ASPEN GROVE
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USP: Discover a captivating and immersive script that masterfully weaves together elements of historical fiction, cultural exploration, and survival storytelling. With its unique blend of Native American traditions, white settler perspectives, and supernatural horror, this story offers a fresh and thought-provoking examination of the human condition. The sharp dialogue, vivid descriptions, and complex moral dilemmas will keep you on the edge of your seat, questioning the true nature of morality, justice, and the consequences of our actions. Immerse yourself in the stunning landscapes of Montana's wilderness and experience the emotional depth of characters grappling with their own beliefs, values, and survival. This script is a must-read for fans of historical and cultural storytelling, as well as those seeking a fresh and original take on the survival genre.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Western, Historical, Thriller, Horror, Adventure, Action, Historical Fiction, Supernatural
Setting: 1845 and 2005, Montana wilderness
Overview: The overall score of 7.25 reflects a strong foundation in character development and thematic depth, but highlights areas for improvement in pacing, emotional complexity, and conflict escalation. The screenplay's unique premise and cultural representation contribute positively to its marketability.
Themes: Survival, Cultural Conflict, Faith and Belief, Justice and Revenge, Nature and the Human Experience
Conflict and Stakes: Geoff's survival and acceptance by the Crow tribe, with the stakes being his life and the tribe's trust. Bill and Ted's conflict lies in their illegal hunting trip and their encounter with dangerous wildlife.
Overall Mood: Tense and suspenseful, with moments of cultural exploration and personal growth.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1, 2: Tense and suspenseful, as Bill and Ted prepare for their hunting trip and encounter dangerous wildlife.
- Scene 3, 4: Culturally explorative, as Geoff interacts with the Crow tribe and learns about their traditions.
- Scene 5, 6: Personal growth-focused, as Geoff adapts to his new environment and forms relationships with the tribe members.
Standout Features:
- Unique Setting: The Montana wilderness in two different time periods, providing a distinctive backdrop for the story.
- Character Development : Geoff's transformation from a trapper to a captive in a foreign culture offers a rich exploration of character growth.
- Cultural Exploration : The film delves into the Crow tribe's culture and traditions, providing a unique perspective on Native American history.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$25-35 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-49, fans of adventure, drama, and survival stories.
Marketability: The story offers a unique blend of adventure, drama, and cultural exploration, with a strong lead character and a diverse cast.
The film's setting and themes may appeal to fans of historical and survival genres, but it may not attract a wider audience.
The film's strong characters, engaging storyline, and unique setting make it a compelling watch for a wide range of viewers.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, depending on the film's marketing and reception.
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Emotions Elicited Percentiles
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Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay has a strong concept with a high originality score (86.29) and emotional impact (81.74), suggesting a unique and engaging story.
- The writer excels in creating engaging content, as indicated by a high engagement score (87.09).
- Character changes and internal goals are well-developed with high percentile rankings (74.43 and 69.35, respectively).
- Plot development requires attention, as indicated by a relatively low plot rating (36.52). The writer could focus on creating more compelling conflicts and raising the stakes to enhance the story's forward momentum.
- Formatting and structure could be improved, with lower percentile scores in formatting_score (14.52) and structure_score (27.42). The writer may consider studying proper screenplay format and story structure to strengthen these areas.
- Dialogue could be more impactful, as the current rating is below average (27.39). The writer might benefit from focusing on making dialogue more concise, meaningful, and advancing the plot.
The writer appears to be a balanced storyteller, demonstrating strengths in both conceptual and intuitive elements. However, there is room for improvement in structural and formatting aspects.
Balancing Elements- The writer may consider focusing on improving plot development while maintaining the strong character changes and emotional impact.
- Incorporating more unpredictable elements into the story could enhance the overall experience, as the current unpredictability score (79.31) is a strength.
The writer appears to be an integrated storyteller, with a balance of intuitive and conceptual elements in their screenplay.
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has a unique concept with engaging characters, but it requires improvement in plot development, structure, and formatting to reach its full potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 77 | Almost Famous: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Scene Conflict Level | 8.2 | 73 | Witness: 8.1 | the boys (TV): 8.2 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 8.1 | 73 | Cruel Intentions: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
Scene Concept | 8.2 | 67 | Hot Fuzz: 8.1 | face/off: 8.2 |
Scene High Stakes | 8.0 | 65 | Witness: 7.9 | Deadpool: 8.0 |
Scene Originality | 8.81 | 60 | The Wolf of Wall Street: 8.80 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 8.81 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.07 | 59 | The usual suspects: 8.06 | The Wizard of oz: 8.07 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.0 | 58 | Zootopia: 6.9 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.0 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.60 | 58 | The Wolf of Wall Street: 7.59 | There's something about Mary: 7.60 |
Scene External Goal | 7.26 | 53 | Witness: 7.25 | Rambo First Blood Part II: 7.26 |
Scene Pacing | 8.31 | 50 | Ghostbusters: 8.30 | Elvis: 8.31 |
1 | 50 | - | Get Out: 1 | |
1 | 50 | - | Get Out: 1 | |
Scene Plot | 7.9 | 49 | 2001: 7.8 | the 5th element: 7.9 |
Script Structure | 7.75 | 34 | Inception: 7.50 | fight Club: 7.75 |
Scene Overall | 8.2 | 34 | Almost Famous: 8.1 | a few good men: 8.2 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.9 | 34 | The Greatest Showman: 7.8 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 7.9 |
Scene Characters | 8.1 | 33 | Memento: 8.0 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.1 |
Script Structure | 8.07 | 29 | Birdman: 8.06 | Thor: 8.07 |
Script Premise | 7.50 | 24 | Zootopia: 7.25 | fight Club: 7.50 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.4 | 23 | Inside Out: 7.3 | face/off: 7.4 |
Script Theme | 7.75 | 21 | Zootopia: 7.50 | fight Club: 7.75 |
Scene Formatting | 8.02 | 21 | Easy A: 8.01 | Get Out: 8.02 |
Script Characters | 7.75 | 20 | Inception: 7.50 | Blade Runner: 7.75 |
Script Conflict | 6.75 | 4 | Inside Out: 6.50 | Le souvenir des belles choses: 6.75 |
Script Emotional Impact | 6.50 | 4 | 2001: 6.25 | Severance: 6.50 |
Overall Script | 7.25 | 4 | Dr. Horrible's Sing-Along Blog: 7.23 | The good place draft: 7.25 |
Script Visual Impact | 6.50 | 2 | 500 days of summer: 6.25 | scream : 6.50 |
Script Originality | 6.50 | 2 | Her: 6.25 | Bonnie and Clyde: 6.50 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp dialogue, vivid descriptions, and a focus on moral dilemmas and interpersonal relationships. The dialogue is natural and authentic, capturing the nuances of the characters and the cultural contexts of the scenes. The descriptions are rich and evocative, immersing the audience in the setting and creating a sense of atmosphere and mood. The writer explores complex moral dilemmas and interpersonal conflicts, delving into the motivations and choices of the characters and raising questions about morality, justice, and the human condition.
Best representation: Scene 12 - The Expulsion of the Priests: A Somber Farewell. This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases all the key elements of their style. The dialogue is sharp and tense, capturing the fear and desperation of the characters. The description is vivid and evocative, creating a sense of suspense and dread. The scene also raises questions about morality and the choices we make in the face of danger.
Memorable Lines:
- TED: Now if you don't mind, I've got a freezer to fill and an empty spot over the mantle. (Scene 1)
- Ted: Oh shit. (Scene 2)
- Geoff: Please spare my life, oh noble Crow! Take my belongings, but spare my life! I only wish to return to civilization and never come back to this godless wilderness. (Scene 3)
- Little Owl: It's okay to cry, little one. I know how it feels. (Scene 4)
- Little Owl: You are not a bee. Bees are noble creatures. You are a wasp. You prey on others, on our children. There is nothing noble about you. You are just a savage. (Scene 8)
Writing Style:
The writing style in this screenplay is characterized by intense dialogue, moral complexity, and unique character interactions, often set against the backdrop of rugged environments and historical contexts. The narrative frequently explores themes of survival, cultural conflict, and human resilience, with a focus on naturalistic storytelling and vivid descriptions of nature.
Style Similarities:
- Cormac McCarthy
- Quentin Tarantino
- Terrence Malick
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Engine: Gemini
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Executive Summary
ASPEN GROVE is a horror screenplay with a unique setting and a thought-provoking exploration of cultural conflict. The strengths lie in its atmosphere, character development, and suspense building. However, pacing issues, underdeveloped elements, and an abrupt ending need to be addressed. With revisions, the screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and distinctive horror film.
- Strong, evocative setting and atmosphere, particularly the portrayal of the Aspen Grove. high
- Compelling exploration of cultural conflict and clashing worldviews between the Crow and the white settlers. high ( Scene 3 Scene 9 Scene 14 )
- Well-developed Crow characters with distinct personalities and motivations, especially Red Wolf and Little Owl. high ( Scene 3 Scene 5 Scene 10 )
- Effective use of foreshadowing and suspense building, leading to the reveal of the Wendigo. medium ( Scene 16 Scene 26 Scene 39 )
- Geoff's character arc, while unlikeable, is a realistic portrayal of greed and entitlement. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 29 Scene 31 )
- Pacing issues, particularly in the middle section with Geoff's trapping montage, which slows down the momentum. high
- Geoff's flashbacks could be more concise and impactful, focusing on key moments rather than extended scenes. medium ( Scene 18 Scene 20 )
- The ending feels somewhat abrupt. Exploring the aftermath of the Wendigo's attack and the Crow family's reunion could add depth. medium ( Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay could benefit from a stronger female character with more agency beyond Little Owl. low
- The dialogue, while effective, could be more nuanced and avoid excessive profanity and religious pronouncements. low
- More exploration of the Wendigo's origins and mythology could enhance the supernatural element. medium
- Deeper exploration of the Crow tribe's spiritual beliefs and practices would enrich the cultural context. low
- The internal conflict within Spotted Wolf could be further developed to show his struggle with grief and anger. low
- The screenplay's exploration of colonialism and its consequences is thought-provoking and relevant. high
- The use of the rabbit's foot as a symbol of both luck and misfortune adds an interesting layer to the story. medium ( Scene 33 Scene 39 )
- Bill's fate is left ambiguous, potentially leaving room for a sequel or further exploration. low ( Scene 1 Scene 41 )
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Aspen Grove' is a well-crafted, genre-blending narrative that explores the complex dynamics between the Crow tribe and encroaching white settlers in historical Montana. With strong characterization, an engrossing plot structure, and a rich, immersive setting, the screenplay effectively balances elements of drama, thriller, and supernatural horror to create a compelling and thought-provoking story. While the pacing and supporting character development could be further refined, the screenplay's strengths, particularly in its thematic depth and the captivating interactions between the central characters, make it a strong candidate for consideration.
- The screenplay demonstrates strong characterization, with well-developed and multi-dimensional protagonists that undergo meaningful arcs throughout the story. high
- The narrative structure is compelling, with a mix of past and present timelines that gradually reveal the backstories and motivations of the central characters. high
- The worldbuilding is rich and immersive, effectively portraying the historical Montana wilderness setting and the cultural dynamics between the Crow tribe and the encroaching white settlers. high
- The screenplay effectively blends elements of drama, thriller, and supernatural horror, creating a story that is both engrossing and unsettling. medium
- The mid-credits and post-credits scenes provide a compelling hook for potential sequels or further exploration of the story's themes and mythology. medium ( Scene 41 )
- The pacing could be tightened in certain sections, particularly during the trapper's extended stay in the Aspen Grove, to maintain a consistent sense of tension and forward momentum. medium
- While the character arcs are strong, some supporting characters could be further developed to provide additional depth and nuance to the narrative. medium
- Certain plot points, such as the trapper's backstory and his confrontation with the Crow tribe, could be further fleshed out to enhance the overall coherence and plausibility of the story. medium
- Additional exploration of the Wendigo mythology and its significance within the Crow culture could further enrich the screenplay's thematic depth. medium
- More contextual information about the historical tensions between the Crow tribe and the encroaching white settlers could provide a stronger foundation for the central conflict. medium
- The interactions between the Crow tribe and the trapper, particularly the exchange of dialogue and the cat-and-mouse dynamic, are exceptionally well-written and engaging. high ( Scene 16 Scene 25 Scene 26 )
- The climactic encounter between the trapper and the Wendigo is a harrowing and visually striking sequence that effectively blends horror and the supernatural. high ( Scene 36 Scene 39 )
- The post-credits scene provides a powerful and emotional resolution, offering a sense of hope and redemption amidst the darkness of the story. high ( Scene 42 )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.5, The screenplay presents a compelling premise that intertwines themes of survival, cultural conflict, and supernatural elements. However, it could benefit from clearer character motivations and a more streamlined narrative structure to enhance audience engagement. See More
Structure: 7.75, The screenplay presents a compelling narrative structure that intertwines themes of survival, morality, and cultural conflict. It effectively develops character arcs, particularly for Bill and Geoff, while maintaining tension throughout. However, there are areas for improvement, particularly in pacing and clarity of certain plot points, which could enhance overall engagement. See More
Theme: 7.75, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes of survival, cultural conflict, and redemption through the character arcs and narrative structure. The exploration of these themes is both poignant and relevant, though there are areas where clarity and integration could be improved to enhance emotional resonance. See More
Visual Impact: 6.5, The screenplay effectively utilizes visual imagery to establish the harsh and unforgiving environment of the Montana wilderness. However, it relies heavily on descriptions of actions and events, lacking in-depth visual descriptions that could enhance the emotional impact and character development. See More
Emotional Impact: 6.5, The screenplay boasts a compelling narrative structure with moments of suspense, violence, and supernatural intrigue. However, the emotional impact is uneven. The character of Red Wolf resonates with his empathy and wisdom, while Geoff's arc, while captivating, could be strengthened by focusing on his moral struggle and internal turmoil. Expanding on the themes of cultural understanding and the power of faith would enhance the emotional depth, allowing for a more impactful and nuanced exploration of the human condition. See More
Conflict: 6.75, The screenplay demonstrates a good foundation of conflict and stakes, particularly in its exploration of cultural clashes and the protagonist's desperate struggle for survival. However, the narrative tension could be amplified by more effectively escalating stakes, deepening character conflicts, and crafting a more satisfying resolution. See More
Originality: 6.5, The screenplay presents a captivating blend of historical fiction, horror, and supernatural elements, offering a unique exploration of cultural clashes and the haunting presence of the wilderness. The script's strength lies in its portrayal of contrasting perspectives between the Crow tribe and a white trapper, woven with chilling encounters with monstrous entities and a touch of metafiction. However, it struggles to fully capitalize on the intriguing premise and the potential of the characters, needing further development to achieve its full creative potential. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Bill and Ted, old friends and hunting partners, arrive at a Montana riverbank in September 2005 to hunt wild boars. Bill, the more cautious of the two, has doubts about the legality of their hunt, while Ted, more reckless, is focused on filling his freezer and getting a trophy. The tense and suspenseful scene shows the men checking their weapons and discussing their plans, with the riverbank, Zodiac boat, and white-barked trees as visual elements.
- Bill and Ted, two armed men, stumble upon an ancient flintlock rifle in an aspen grove, only to be confronted by a mysterious and menacing creature with glowing eyes. One man is brutally killed, causing the other to wet himself in fear. The scene ends with the remaining man in fear for his life.
- Fur trapper Geoff is captured by a group of Crow warriors led by Red Wolf in the Montana wilderness. Despite initial hostility, the group decides to spare Geoff's life, much to his relief. However, Red Wolf's son, Spotted Wolf, expresses disapproval, creating tension within the group.
- The scene is set at a Crow encampment where women and children prepare for the hunting party's return. Little Owl, a 50-year-old Crow woman, teaches her granddaughters about drying fish and shares her experiences as a girl growing up in the tribe. The girls express their sadness about their mother's absence and their desire to go hunting with their father and grandfather. Little Owl reassures them, sharing her own experiences of longing and patience.
- Spotted Wolf and his sons return from a successful hunt, bringing a trapped white man, Geoff, with them. The Crow tribe, including Red Wolf and Little Owl, greet them and discuss Geoff's fate. Amidst curiosity, skepticism, and caution, they decide to let him stay the night, and Red Wolf adopts Mutt, Geoff's dog. The scene takes place outside the Crow encampment, and the main conflict is the tribe's suspicion towards Geoff, resolved by Little Owl's decision to let him stay. The tone is a mix of curiosity, skepticism, and warmth, with key dialogue focusing on Geoff's pleading for mercy and Little Owl's eventual agreement. Visually, Spotted Wolf carries Geoff's rifle and satchel, and Geoff is blindfolded. The scene ends with Geoff staying the night and Red Wolf adopting Mutt.
- In this scene, Red Wolf and his grandsons examine a stranger named Geoff for signs of injury or disease at a Crow encampment by the shore. Red Wolf becomes disappointed and suspicious upon discovering four parallel scratches on Geoff's face, which conflicts with his hope that not all white men are wicked. The scene ends with Red Wolf's negative attitude towards Geoff, and the conflict remains unresolved.
- In this exterior evening scene at the Crow encampment, Geoff, a man with incontinence issues, is allowed to eat with the Crow tribe. The tribe jokes about his condition, and a young huntress feeds Lifesaver, who growls at Geoff. Tension arises as Geoff, skeptical and unaccepting, mutters to himself and walks into the forest to relieve himself, while unseen watchful eyes observe him from the treetops. The scene is filled with a mix of tension, humor, and curiosity, with conflicts left unresolved.
- In the darkness behind a tree on the outskirts of a Crow encampment, trapper Geoff urinates while making lewd comments about a young Crow girl. Spotted Wolf and Little Owl confront him, followed by Red Wolf and his grandsons. The conflict escalates as Little Owl threatens and chokes Geoff, ultimately pressing a knife to his groin and delivering a scathing monologue. The Crow group leaves Geoff unconscious and humiliated, ending the tense and threatening scene.
- Geoff, a God-fearing trapper, regains consciousness outside the Crow encampment and prays for deliverance. Red Wolf narrates a story about his mother's kindness and teachings in English for Geoff's understanding. The Crows observe and interact with Geoff, displaying a mix of curiosity, skepticism, and aggression. The scene highlights the cultural and moral differences between Geoff and the Crows, with the conflict unresolved. It ends with Spotted Wolf silencing Geoff's prayers and Red Wolf continuing his story.
- In a somber flashback, Red Wolf narrates a scene of six emaciated priests found by his tribe in the Montana wilderness. After being attacked by the Blackfeet, the priests are starving and weak, reduced to gnawing on horse bones. The last survivor burns a Bible for warmth beside his dead comrade, emphasizing their vulnerability and dire circumstances.
- In this nostalgic and hopeful scene, Red Wolf recounts a past encounter of their tribe with four white men, who were traumatized and bedraggled. The Crow tribe, led by a matriarch, showed them kindness and hospitality, tending to their needs, feeding, and sheltering them. One of the white men, called Kansas Man, taught the Crow tribe their language and about their 'Man in the Sky'. The scene ends with Kansas Man expressing his gratitude to the matriarch of the Crow tribe.
- In this serious and somber scene, Geoff listens to Red Wolf, an old man from the Crow tribe, as he recounts a story from the past. The Crow people were affected by a disease that caused red bumps on their skin, weakness, and difficulty breathing, leading to many deaths. Red Wolf mentions that blame for the disease fell on white Holy Men. The conflict of the disease and blame is not resolved in this scene, and the scene ends with Red Wolf finishing his story, leaving the audience to consider its impact.
- In a flashback to a Crow encampment, the three priests are being expelled for being blamed for the deaths of many Crow. Given canoes, supplies, and food by the Crow, including Red Wolf's mother, only Kansas Man remains behind, showing them mercy. The scene is somber and reflective, with Red Wolf providing a voice-over explaining his mother's insistence on showing mercy. The visual elements include the two canoes on the river bank, the Crow pushing the priests away in the canoes, and Kansas Man waving goodbye to the exiles. The scene ends with the exiles floating away down the river, with Kansas Man standing alone on the river bank.
- In this tense and suspenseful scene, Geoff, a desperate trapper, tries to escape from the Crow encampment by going down the river. He convinces Red Wolf to let him go by claiming he has renounced his wicked ways and is now reformed. However, Little Owl, the elder Crow woman, suspects he is lying and confirms her suspicions when she sees the scratches on his face. She calls him a pig and stalks away, leaving him alone and still trapped. The main conflict lies between Geoff and Little Owl, and the key pieces of dialogue include Geoff's claims of reform and Little Owl's confirmation of his lying. Significant visual elements include Geoff's desperate attempts to escape and Little Owl's vicious slap to silence him.
- In a Crow encampment, Kansas Man fervently prays for the healing of the sick Crow matron as her son, Red Wolf, weeps beside her. The scene, a flashback triggered by Red Wolf's encounter with Geoff, highlights the desperation and grief of the two men, while showcasing the conflict of the matron's sickness and the hope for her recovery. The emotional tone is heavy with sadness, grief, and a touch of hope, as Kansas Man pleads with the 'Man in the Sky' for healing. The scene ends with Red Wolf breaking down in sobs, adding to the emotional tension.
- In this tense and confrontational scene, Red Wolf, a grieving Crow elder, expresses his anger and disappointment towards the Christian God and denounces the white man's claim to Crow land. Geoff, a defiant white trapper, defends their actions and asserts their divine right to the land. The conflict between the two characters, regarding differing beliefs and values, is not resolved. The scene ends with a moment of humor as Lifesaver, a dog, urinates on Geoff in response to his aggressive words.
- Geoff, a blindfolded and gagged trapper, wakes up in Red Wolf's teepee and finds himself hogtied in the center of the tent, surrounded by weapons and furs. Red Wolf, the Crow leader, cuts him free and makes it clear that Geoff's life depends on his honesty. The tense scene is filled with suspicion and hostility, but Geoff's respectful tone and truthful recount of his situation resolve the conflict, leading Red Wolf to listen intently to his story.
- In a flashback to their Montana wilderness journey two months ago, Geoff and Hervé ride horses, follow game trails, and trap game. Struggling to find game, they make camp nearby. Despite the challenges, they share a sense of camaraderie and nostalgia. The scene is filled with visuals of grassland, distant mountains, and a rabbit's foot memento, accompanied by reflective narration from Geoff.
- In the teepee of Crow Chief Red Wolf, trapper Geoff recounts an ambush by a Blackfoot raiding party. Believing divine intervention saved him, Geoff's cultural perspective clashes with Red Wolf's disbelief and skepticism, creating tension and curiosity. The scene ends with Red Wolf pondering Geoff's story, leaving the truth uncertain.
- In a tense and violent nighttime scene, two white trappers, Geoff and Hervé, are attacked in their camp by four Blackfoot warriors. From his hiding place in the underbrush, Geoff watches in horror as the warriors untie their horses, gather drying skins, and kill Hervé by tearing his scalp off. The scene ends abruptly, leaving Geoff and the audience in shock and horror.
- In this somber and emotional scene, Geoff tells Red Wolf the story of how Hervé was killed by thieves. He describes finding Hervé with a slit throat and holding him as he died. Geoff also reveals that the bruises on his back, previously assumed to be from the thieves, were actually caused by his own horse. The scene takes place inside the Crow chieftain's teepee and highlights the conflict between Geoff's desire to tell the truth and his fear of appearing weak. The dialogue and visual elements emphasize Geoff's emotional state and the traumatic events of Hervé's death. The scene ends with Red Wolf urging Geoff to continue his story.
- In a dark and tense flashback scene, Geoff, a scruffy Mutt, and a teenage Blackfoot warrior converge at an empty trapper's camp at night. After Hervé's death, Geoff is covered in blood, while the Blackfoot warrior searches Hervé's body, taking his satchel, pistol, and rifle. As the warrior prepares to leave, Geoff sneaks up, preparing to attack in revenge. The Mutt observes, wagging its tail. The scene ends with Geoff poised to strike, building tension and anticipation for the outcome.
- In a tense and violent flashback, Geoff recounts his physical fight with a Blackfoot teen during a previous encounter. The conflict, driven by survival instincts and dominance, takes place in a trapper's camp at night. Despite gaining the upper hand, wounding the teen, and preparing to deliver the final blow with a rock, Geoff ultimately spares the Blackfoot teen's life. The scene transitions between the Crow chieftain's teepee and the trapper's camp, leaving the outcome of the conflict unresolved. Geoff's scratches, the rock, the weakened state of the Blackfoot teen, and the wounded horse running off into the night serve as significant visual elements in this intense and uncertain scene.
- In a dark and tense scene, Geoff, a lone survivor, shares his harrowing experience of killing a Blackfoot and eating his dog for survival. The flashback reveals Geoff's blood-streaked buckskins and the Montana wilderness during sunset. The internal conflict of survival and morality is evident in Geoff's narrative, while the external conflict of the Blackfeet chasing him adds to the tension. The scene ends with Geoff finishing his story and the flashback fading out.
- In Red Wolf's teepee, suspicious Geoff gathers supplies as cautious Red Wolf, who speaks English from white man's bibles, cuts his bindings. Geoff insists God saved him, but Red Wolf argues it was his dog. Red Wolf offers a canoe for Geoff to leave and never return, which he eventually accepts, ending the tense scene.
- Geoff, accompanied by Kicking Bird and other Crow tribe members, prepares to depart on his journey in a canoe. The group discusses the trip ahead, and Red Wolf gifts Geoff a Bible that once belonged to Kansas Man, warning him about the perilous White Woods. Despite underlying tension and skepticism from some Crow members, the scene remains lighthearted and humorous, with Geoff ultimately setting off downstream, accompanied by the well-wishes and cautions of the onlooking tribe.
- In a Montana river, fur trapper Geoff taunts and threatens a group of Crow onlookers, promising to return with a militia to harm them. The Crow remain silent and only observe him. The scene ends with Geoff continuing to float down the river, still taunting the Crow.
- The Crow family watches a canoe drift downstream, discussing the fate of its occupant. They decide to take their daughters on future journeys and share personal stories, expressing their feelings and demonstrating their strong family bond. Despite the emotional tone, the scene ends on a hopeful note as they come to a consensus about the canoe occupant's fate and look forward to future adventures together.
- In this chaotic and stressful scene, Geoff, exhausted from paddling, falls asleep in the canoe while on the Montana River. The current takes the canoe downstream, causing it to crash into rocks and boulders, damaging the boat and dumping cargo. Geoff is thrown from the canoe and gets his leg trapped in a bear trap underwater. After freeing himself, he drags himself to shore and wanders into a clearing near a forest. The scene ends with Geoff collapsing on the bank, exhausted and soaked from his ordeal in the river.
- Geoff, a trapper, experiences frustration and anger in an Aspen grove at sunset while trying to make a meal and check his gear. He discovers his Bowie knife, hatchet, and other knives broken, dull, or damaged, but is able to salvage his deer rifle and pistol. In a fit of rage, he rants against the natives before setting off to explore the area, still hungry and angry. The scene highlights Geoff's struggle against the environment and his own gear, with a tone of frustration, anger, and desperation.
- In an aspen grove by the river, Geoff sets up snares near a muskrat lodge after spotting a beaver. Excitement fills the air as he returns to camp, only to be awakened by a grunting wild boar, which he shoots. The thrill turns to fear when he follows the blood trail and encounters a bear, forcing him to flee back to camp in a race for safety and the deer rifle.
- Geoff, while attempting to reach his camp for a deer rifle, steps into a bear trap, suffering from shattered leg bones. A bear appears and attacks him, leading to a fierce struggle. Geoff, in a final attempt to defend himself, hits the bear with a flaming log. However, the bear overpowers him, crushing his chest and ultimately biting off his head, leading to Geoff's untimely death.
- Geoff awakens from a nightmare, covered in sweat and dirt, with his satchel stuck to his face. After cleaning up, he inspects his repaired boat and sets muskrat traps. The scene then shows Geoff killing and skinning various animals, including a rabbit. Throughout this process, Geoff expresses internal conflict, guilt, and fear from his previous bear encounter. He promises Old Crow that he will leave after one more night, but his continued hunting suggests a struggle to let go of his old ways.
- Geoff, a trapper, finishes his meal and drinks from a flask in Aspen Grove under a moonless night. He tears out a page from his bible, writes notes using a goose feather, and throws the bible into the fire, expressing his disbelief in God. Holding a deer rifle, he challenges the universe to take his life, ending the scene in a state of defiant disbelief.
- In this horrifying scene, Geoff, the trapper, is awakened by mysterious footsteps and confronts what he thinks is his companion, Old Crow. Instead, he finds pale, skeletal figures with grotesque injuries. Recognizing one as his own doppelganger, he tries to shoot it, but his gun fails. He flees, trips, and is overpowered by the abominations, who brutally attack and mutilate him. The scene takes place in an aspen grove, and the conflicts arise between Geoff and the mysterious figures. The tone is tense and horrifying, with Geoff's fear and desperation palpable throughout the scene.
- In an aspen grove at 3:33 AM, Geoff, awakened by a nightmare, hears a twig snap and readies his rifle, thinking it's a threat. He is confronted by the Horned God, a massive supernatural creature, which causes him to levitate and go limp. Geoff, paralyzed with fear, tries to shoot it but his rifle misfires and his pistol is empty. The Horned God's hypnotic eyes and massive size leave Geoff helpless as the scene ends with him levitating off the ground.
- The scene opens in the Montana Wilderness, where Mutt, a dog, is running along a stream bank. Geoff, an aggressive character, is spying on a young Blackfoot girl picking blackberries. He attacks and drags her into the forest, despite her attempts to fight back. The scene ends with the girl still struggling against Geoff.
- At their camp, trappers Geoff and Hervé plan to assault a kidnapped young woman, but are interrupted by a Blackfoot boy looking for his sister. In the ensuing chaos, the woman escapes, the trappers are killed, and the boy is saved by Mutt, who bites Geoff's calf. The scene ends with Geoff fleeing, pursued by Mutt.
- Geoff, under the Wendigo's spell, urinates on the campfire, which breaks the trance. The Wendigo then disembowels him, causing his insides to spill out. Shocked, Geoff watches as his body shrivels, and his essence is consumed by the Great Spirit. The Wendigo starts eating Geoff's entrails while his animated corpse staggers into the forest, becoming more intangible until it disappears. The scene is dark, intense, and horrifying, with Geoff's question 'Wait, am I still dreaming?' as the key dialogue.
- The scene opens in an aspen grove at dusk, where a poacher has been killed and his body dragged away by a mysterious creature. The scene then shifts to a hospital at night, where the surviving poacher, Bill, lies heavily bandaged and unresponsive. Hospital staff, Tina and Amy, discuss Bill's condition and the incident, making light of the situation. The scene ends with Bill left alone in the dim light of the hospital room, with no indication of his recovery.
- In a hospital room at 3:33am, Bill, in a catatonic state, suddenly begins to show signs of improvement. His heart rate increases rapidly, triggering an alarm, and his feet twitch. As he awakens, he opens his hand to reveal a rabbit's foot keychain, and tears of joy stream down his face. The room is filled with a misty, glowing blue aether emitted from his eyes. Bill, shocked and relieved, says 'Holy shit.' The scene ends with a cut to black and the credits, marking a hopeful turn of events.
- In a post-credits scene, a Native American family reunites in an aspen grove by the river's shore. After finding their abandoned boat and property, Spotted Wolf, his two daughters, Little Owl, and Spotted Wolf's wife embrace in tears of joy. The scene is filled with emotional reactions, set against the backdrop of the natural environment, and ends with the family reunited and the forest alive with sounds of wildlife.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Bill | Bill starts as a cautious and morally conflicted character who is hesitant about illegal activities. He is then traumatized by a supernatural encounter, leading to a catatonic state. His awakening marks a pivotal moment where he experiences a range of emotions and ultimately finds a sense of wonder and disbelief. This transformation from reluctance to trauma to awakening adds depth to his character. | The character arc for Bill is well-developed and provides a clear progression for his journey. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal struggles and growth throughout the feature. It would be beneficial to explore his moral conflict in more depth and show how it evolves over time. Additionally, his awakening could be further explored to showcase the impact of his experiences on his psyche. | To improve the character arc, consider adding more internal monologues or moments of reflection for Bill to delve into his moral conflict and emotional turmoil. Show his gradual transformation from reluctance to trauma to awakening through subtle changes in his behavior and dialogue. Additionally, explore the aftermath of his awakening to highlight the lasting effects of his experiences on his character. |
Geoff | Geoff starts off as an arrogant and confrontational trapper who believes in the superiority of white settlers. However, as he faces betrayal and loss, he descends into violence and revenge. Through his encounters with the Crow tribe and supernatural entities, Geoff is forced to confront his own dark nature and seek redemption. Ultimately, he transforms from a selfish and deceitful individual to someone who sees a glimmer of hope for salvation. | The character arc for Geoff is compelling and engaging, showcasing a complex journey of self-discovery and redemption. However, there could be more clarity in his motivations and internal struggles throughout the screenplay. Additionally, the transition from arrogance to vulnerability could be further developed to create a more impactful and believable transformation. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Geoff's backstory and motivations, providing more insight into his past actions and how they shape his present choices. Focus on building stronger emotional connections between Geoff and the audience, allowing for a more empathetic portrayal of his struggles and growth. Additionally, ensure that the evolution of Geoff's character is consistent and well-paced, with clear moments of realization and change throughout the screenplay. |
Red Wolf | Red Wolf's character arc involves grappling with trust, betrayal, and the survival of his people. Throughout the screenplay, he navigates the challenges of balancing his cultural traditions with his personal beliefs, ultimately learning to trust outsiders like Geoff and finding a way to protect his tribe while also showing mercy and understanding. His journey is one of growth, resilience, and reconciliation as he confronts his past losses and embraces a new path forward for his people. | The character arc for Red Wolf is well-developed and engaging, offering a compelling exploration of his internal struggles and external challenges. However, there could be more clarity in showcasing his transformation and growth throughout the screenplay. Additionally, more emphasis on his relationships with other characters, particularly Geoff, could add depth and nuance to his arc. | To improve the character arc for Red Wolf, consider incorporating more scenes that highlight his evolving relationships with Geoff and other key characters. Showcasing moments of vulnerability, conflict, and resolution can further enhance his journey and make his growth more impactful for the audience. Additionally, exploring the nuances of his cultural heritage and the impact of external forces on his tribe can add layers to his character development. |
Spotted Wolf | Spotted Wolf starts off as a conflicted warrior torn between tradition and modernity, struggling with his emotions and past traumas. Throughout the screenplay, he learns to reconcile his inner conflicts and embrace his role as a strong and protective leader. He overcomes his resentments towards outsiders and learns to trust and work with them for the greater good of his tribe. By the end of the feature, Spotted Wolf has found peace within himself and has become a respected and wise leader who values both tradition and modernity. | The character arc for Spotted Wolf is well-developed and provides a clear progression for his growth and development. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and emotional journey. Additionally, his interactions with outsiders could be further explored to show a more nuanced perspective on trust and acceptance. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Spotted Wolf's past traumas and resentments towards outsiders. Show more internal conflict and emotional vulnerability to make his journey more relatable and impactful. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters, especially outsiders, to provide a more nuanced portrayal of trust and acceptance. |
Little Owl | Little Owl starts as a wise and nurturing grandmother figure, guiding her family with traditional wisdom. As the story progresses, she evolves into a formidable and cunning matriarch, willing to do whatever it takes to protect her tribe. However, through a profound emotional moment during the family reunion, she learns to balance her strength with vulnerability, ultimately finding a deeper connection with her loved ones. | The character arc for Little Owl is well-developed, showcasing her evolution from a wise grandmother to a formidable matriarch. However, the transition from her sharp and cutting nature to a more vulnerable and emotionally connected state could be further explored to create a more impactful and cohesive character journey. | To improve the character arc, consider adding more scenes that highlight Little Owl's internal struggles and growth, showing her gradual shift from a stoic and observant figure to a more emotionally connected matriarch. This could involve delving deeper into her relationships with her family members and exploring the reasons behind her protective nature, ultimately leading to a more satisfying and nuanced character development. |
Old Crow | Old Crow starts off as a mysterious and enigmatic figure, serving as a symbolic presence and target for Geoff's defiance and anger. As the story progresses, Old Crow's malevolent and supernatural nature is revealed, adding an element of horror and danger to the narrative. However, towards the climax, it is revealed that Old Crow has been guiding and protecting the protagonist all along, leading to a moment of redemption and understanding for both characters. | The character arc for Old Crow is intriguing and adds depth to the story. However, the transition from malevolent to protective could be more clearly developed to create a stronger emotional impact. Additionally, more hints and foreshadowing of Old Crow's true nature throughout the screenplay could help build suspense and anticipation for the reveal. | To improve the character arc, consider adding subtle hints and clues about Old Crow's true intentions earlier in the screenplay. This could include mysterious symbols or actions that hint at his protective nature, creating a sense of mystery and intrigue for the audience. Additionally, focus on developing the relationship between Old Crow and the protagonist to make the redemption moment more impactful and satisfying for the audience. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||
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Survival | Multiple characters face life-threatening situations, such as bear attacks, harsh weather conditions, and dangerous journeys; themes of self-preservation, resourcefulness, and resilience are prevalent. | The screenplay explores the human will to survive in harsh environments, the importance of resourcefulness, and the instinctive desire to protect oneself from harm. | ||
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Cultural Conflict | The story highlights the clash between European settlers and Native American tribes, with themes of misunderstanding, mistrust, and violence. | The screenplay delves into the historical tensions between different cultures, emphasizing the consequences of cultural misunderstandings and the potential for violence. | ||
Faith and Belief | Various characters express different beliefs and faiths, from Christianity to traditional Native American spirituality, and the role of faith in survival and decision-making is explored. | The screenplay examines the power of faith and belief in shaping human behavior, decision-making, and resilience, as well as the potential for conflict between different belief systems. | ||
Justice and Revenge | Some characters seek revenge for past wrongs, while others advocate for forgiveness and understanding, leading to themes of justice, retribution, and mercy. | The screenplay delves into the complexities of justice, revenge, and forgiveness, exploring the emotional and moral consequences of each approach. | ||
Nature and the Human Experience | The story takes place in the Montana wilderness, highlighting the beauty, power, and danger of nature, and the ways in which the human experience is shaped by the natural world. | The screenplay emphasizes the role of nature in shaping human behavior, decision-making, and relationships, and the ways in which the natural world can be both a source of wonder and a source of danger. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | Description of the protagonist's internal goals as they evolved throughout the script |
External Goals | Description of the protagonist's external goals as they evolved throughout the script |
Philosophical Conflict | Description of the overarching philosophical conflict and how it intertwines with the protagonist's journey |
Character Development Contribution: How the goals and conflict contribute to the character's development
Narrative Structure Contribution: How the goals and conflict contribute to the narrative structure of the screenplay
Thematic Depth Contribution: How the goals and conflict contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Nighttime Hunting Trip Preparations: Bill and Ted's Montana Boar Hunt Improve | Suspenseful, Dark, Humorous | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Deadly Encounter in the Aspen Grove Improve | Suspenseful, Terrifying, Shocking | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Captured by the Crow Warriors Improve | Tense, Emotional, Serious, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Little Owl's Lessons: Patience and Longing Improve | Nostalgic, Reflective, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 4 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - The Crow Tribe's Unexpected Guest: A White Man Named Geoff Improve | Tense, Humorous, Heartwarming | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Red Wolf's Suspicion of the Stranger Improve | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Geoff's Uneasy Dining Experience with the Crow Tribe Improve | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Confrontation and Humiliation: Geoff's Lewd Actions Lead to His Downfall Improve | Menacing, Intense, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
9 - Geoff's Prayers and Red Wolf's Story Improve | Intense, Religious, Confrontational, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Desperation in the Montana Wilderness Improve | Dark, Suspenseful, Intense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - A Glimpse into the Past: The Crow Tribe's Kindness and Hospitality Improve | Serious, Tense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Red Wolf's Story: A Deadly Disease and Blame Improve | Suspenseful, Dark, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - The Expulsion of the Priests: A Somber Farewell Improve | Serious, Tense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Geoff's Failed Escape Attempt and Little Owl's Suspicions Improve | Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - A Prayer for the Sick Matron Improve | Grief, Desperation, Hope | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - A Confrontation of Beliefs: Red Wolf vs. Geoff Improve | Angry, Defiant, Reflective, Confrontational | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - A Fateful Encounter: Geoff's Fate Hangs in the Balance Improve | Serious, Intense, Suspenseful, Resolute | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - A Nostalgic Journey Through the Montana Wilderness Improve | Tense, Suspenseful, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Ambush and Divine Intervention: A Trapper's Tale Improve | Suspenseful, Intense, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
20 - Nighttime Attack on Trappers' Camp Improve | Tense, Suspenseful, Dark, Grim | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - Geoff Recounts the Traumatic Story of His Partner Hervé's Death Improve | Grief, Remorse, Defensiveness | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Geoff's Revenge: A Deadly Encounter at the Trapper's Camp Improve | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Geoff's Brush with Violence: A Life-or-Death Struggle Improve | Intense, Dark, Violent | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Geoff's Necessary Act: A Tale of Survival Improve | Dark, Intense, Gritty | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - A Wary Parting: Red Wolf Spares Geoff's Life Improve | Tense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Geoff's Journey Begins: A Promised Voyage Down the River Improve | Sarcastic, Foreboding, Intense, Skeptical | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Fur Trapper Geoff Taunts and Threatens Crow Onlookers Improve | Intense, Threatening, Vengeful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
28 - Crow Family Reflects on Past and Future Journeys Improve | Emotional, Reflective, Resigned | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Geoff's Perilous Journey Down the Montana River Improve | null | 0 | 0 | 0 | 9 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 7 | 0 | 8 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 0 | 0 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
30 - Geoff's Frustration: A Struggle Against the Wilderness Improve | Angry, Desperate, Defiant | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Geoff's Thrilling Encounter with Wildlife Improve | Intense, Suspenseful, Thrilling, Dark, Violent | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
32 - Geoff's Tragic Encounter with a Bear Improve | Terror, Desperation, Violence | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Geoff's Struggle: Survival and Self-Reflection Improve | Gritty, Intense, Dark, Violent | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Geoff's Defiant Disbelief Improve | Defiant, Dark, Intense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - Geoff's Terrifying Encounter with the Pale, Skeletal Figures Improve | Terror, Desperation, Violence | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Geoff's Fateful Encounter with the Horned God Improve | Terror, Spiritual, Supernatural, Intense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Violent Encounter in the Montana Wilderness Improve | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Escape and Escape: A Forest Confrontation Improve | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful, Violent | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Geoff's Fatal Encounter with the Wendigo Improve | Dark, Menacing, Terrifying | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - Aftermath of a Deadly Encounter: A Poacher's Fate Improve | Dark, Suspenseful, Grim, Mysterious | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - Bill's Awakening: A Hopeful Dawn Improve | Terror, Mystery, Suspense, Shock, Relief | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | |
42 - Heartwarming Reunion by the River Improve | Joyful, Tense, Mystical | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Intense atmosphere
- Compelling character dynamics
- Emotional depth
- Effective tension-building
- Sharp dialogue
Scene Weaknesses
- Some dialogue could be tightened
- Potential for stereotypical portrayals
- Lack of resolution in the scene
- Some potentially offensive content
- Limited character development
Suggestions
- Focus on tightening dialogue and avoiding cliched or dramatic language
- Avoid potentially offensive content or stereotypical portrayals
- Work on creating more nuanced character development
- Ensure all plot points are resolved satisfactorily
- Continue to build on strengths with effective world-building, rich character dynamics, and emotionally impactful moments
- Physical environment: The screenplay takes place in various settings, including the Montana wilderness, Crow encampments, and a riverbank. The physical environment is depicted as vast, rugged, and unforgiving, with dense forests, mountains, and bodies of water. The changing seasons also play a significant role, with scenes set in autumn, winter, and spring. The environment shapes the characters' experiences by presenting them with challenges such as harsh weather conditions, dangerous wildlife, and difficult terrain.
- Culture: The screenplay features two main cultures: the Crow tribe and white settlers/trappers. The Crow tribe has a rich culture with unique language, customs, values, and societal structures. They have a deep respect for nature and a strong sense of community. In contrast, the white settlers/trappers are portrayed as rugged individuals who value survival and self-sufficiency. The cultural elements contribute to the narrative by highlighting the clash between these two cultures and the consequences of their interactions.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is hierarchical, with clear roles and responsibilities for each member of the community. The Crow tribe has a matriarchal society, with women holding positions of power and influence. The white settlers/trappers, on the other hand, have a more individualistic society, with each person responsible for their own survival. The societal structure shapes the characters' experiences by defining their roles and expectations within their communities.
- Technology: The technology in the screenplay is minimal, with a focus on primitive tools and weapons. The Crow tribe uses traditional tools such as knives, bows and arrows, and flint and striker for fire-making. The white settlers/trappers use more advanced weapons such as rifles and pistols. The technological elements contribute to the narrative by highlighting the characters' reliance on these tools for survival and the impact they have on their interactions with each other and the environment.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by presenting them with challenges and opportunities. The characters must navigate the harsh wilderness, interact with different cultures, and use the available technology to survive and achieve their goals.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by providing context, tension, and conflict. The physical environment presents the characters with challenges and dangers, while the cultural and societal structures create conflicts and power dynamics. The technology available to the characters influences their actions and decisions, shaping the narrative in meaningful ways.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by highlighting themes such as survival, community, power, and the impact of technology on society. The contrast between the Crow tribe and white settlers/trappers highlights the consequences of cultural clashes and the importance of respect for nature and community. The harsh physical environment and minimal technology emphasize the characters' reliance on each other and their resourcefulness in the face of adversity.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by sharp dialogue, vivid descriptions, and a focus on moral dilemmas and interpersonal relationships. The dialogue is natural and authentic, capturing the nuances of the characters and the cultural contexts of the scenes. The descriptions are rich and evocative, immersing the audience in the setting and creating a sense of atmosphere and mood. The writer explores complex moral dilemmas and interpersonal conflicts, delving into the motivations and choices of the characters and raising questions about morality, justice, and the human condition. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of authenticity, depth, and emotional resonance. The dialogue and descriptions bring the characters to life and make the audience invested in their journeys and struggles. The exploration of moral dilemmas and interpersonal conflicts adds depth and complexity to the story, making it more than just a simple narrative but a thought-provoking examination of human nature and the choices we make. |
Best Representation Scene | 12 - Red Wolf's Story: A Deadly Disease and Blame |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases all the key elements of their style. The dialogue is sharp and tense, capturing the fear and desperation of the characters. The description is vivid and evocative, creating a sense of suspense and dread. The scene also raises questions about morality and the choices we make in the face of danger. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Strong correlation between tone and emotional impact | Scenes with darker tones such as 'Menacing', 'Dark', and 'Terrifying' tend to have higher emotional impact scores. This suggests that the emotional impact of a scene is heightened when the tone is more intense or suspenseful. |
Character changes and conflict | Scenes with higher conflict scores also tend to have higher character changes scores. This indicates that conflict within a scene often leads to significant character development or transformation. |
Dialogue and emotional impact | Scenes with higher emotional impact scores also tend to have higher dialogue scores. This suggests that impactful dialogue plays a key role in evoking emotions in the audience. |
Plot and high stakes | Scenes with higher high stakes scores tend to have higher plot scores. This implies that raising the stakes in a scene is closely tied to advancing the plot and increasing tension. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases strong character development, vivid descriptions, and thematic depth across various scenes. The writer demonstrates a unique voice and an ability to create engaging narratives with emotional resonance. However, there is room for improvement in areas such as pacing, dialogue, and scene structure.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Save the Cat! Writes a Novel by Jessica Brody | This book provides practical tips and techniques for crafting compelling characters and story arcs, which can help improve character development and scene structure in your screenplay. |
Exercise | Write a scene with conflicting character goals and motivationsPractice In SceneProv | This exercise will help you deepen character motivations and create more nuanced conflicts, enhancing the emotional impact of your scenes. |
Screenplay | Study screenplays with strong pacing and structure, such as 'The Shawshank Redemption' or 'Inception' | Analyzing successful screenplays can provide valuable insights into crafting engaging narratives with clear structures and effective pacing. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Hero's Journey | Geoff's story follows a classic hero's journey, with a call to adventure (his decision to trap in Montana), a mentor (Red Wolf), challenges and enemies (the bear, the Blackfoot tribe), a transformation (his change in perspective about the natives), and a return (his eventual departure from the Crow encampment). | The Hero's Journey is a common narrative structure in literature and film, where a hero embarks on an adventure, faces and overcomes a crisis, and then returns home transformed. This trope is seen in many works, such as 'Star Wars' and 'The Lion King'. |
The Captivity Narrative | Geoff's capture and stay at the Crow encampment is a form of the captivity narrative, a genre of literature that tells the story of a person who is captured by a foreign culture and then assimilates into that culture. | The captivity narrative is a common trope in American literature, with examples like 'The Last of the Mohicans' and 'The Searchers'. It often involves a cultural clash and the eventual assimilation of the captive. |
The Noble Savage | The Crow tribe is portrayed as a noble and wise culture, with Red Wolf as a wise and just leader. | The Noble Savage is a literary stock character that depicts native people as being virtuous, pure, and close to nature. This trope is seen in works like 'The Noble Savage' by John Dryden and 'The Tempest' by William Shakespeare. |
The Magical Negro | Red Wolf serves as a mentor and guide for Geoff, helping him to see the error of his ways and transforming him into a better person. | The Magical Negro is a racial stereotype in American cinema where a black character serves as a spiritual guide or mentor for a white character. This trope is seen in films like 'The Green Mile' and 'The Legend of Bagger Vance'. |
The White Man's Burden | The story explores the idea of the white man's burden, or the belief that it is the responsibility of white people to civilize and improve non-white people. | The White Man's Burden is a racial ideology that was used to justify colonialism and imperialism. It is seen in works like 'Heart of Darkness' by Joseph Conrad and 'Kim' by Rudyard Kipling. |
The Trickster | Red Wolf often uses trickery and deception to outwit his enemies, such as when he tricks Geoff into thinking he will be killed. | The Trickster is a common archetype in mythology and literature, often depicted as a cunning and deceptive character. This trope is seen in works like 'The Trickster' by Lewis Hyde and 'American Gods' by Neil Gaiman. |
The Frontier Myth | The story explores the idea of the frontier myth, or the belief that the American West was a wild and untamed land that needed to be conquered and civilized by white settlers. | The Frontier Myth is a cultural narrative that has shaped American history and identity. It is seen in works like 'The Virginian' by Owen Wister and 'The Magnificent Seven'. |
The Lost World | The story explores the idea of a lost world, or a place that is untouched by modern civilization and where ancient cultures and creatures still exist. | The Lost World is a common trope in adventure literature, often depicting a place that is cut off from the rest of the world and where ancient creatures still roam. This trope is seen in works like 'The Lost World' by Arthur Conan Doyle and 'Jurassic Park' by Michael Crichton. |
The Wild Man | Geoff is portrayed as a wild man, a man who lives outside of society and civilized norms. | The Wild Man is a literary stock character that depicts a man who lives outside of society and civilized norms. This trope is seen in works like 'The Tempest' by William Shakespeare and 'The Jungle Book' by Rudyard Kipling. |
The Stranger in a Strange Land | Geoff is a stranger in a strange land, a man who is out of his element and must navigate a foreign culture. | The Stranger in a Strange Land is a common trope in literature and film, often depicting a character who is out of their element and must navigate a foreign culture. This trope is seen in works like 'The Odyssey' by Homer and 'The Martian' by Andy Weir. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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1 | TED: Now if you don't mind, I've got a freezer to fill and an empty spot over the mantle. |
2 | Ted: Oh shit. |
3 | Geoff: Please spare my life, oh noble Crow! Take my belongings, but spare my life! I only wish to return to civilization and never come back to this godless wilderness. |
4 | Little Owl: It's okay to cry, little one. I know how it feels. |
8 | Little Owl: You are not a bee. Bees are noble creatures. You are a wasp. You prey on others, on our children. There is nothing noble about you. You are just a savage. |
Some Loglines to consider:
A greedy fur trapper's encounter with a Native American tribe leads to a terrifying confrontation with a legendary creature in the Montana wilderness. |
In 1845, a Crow family's act of mercy towards a wounded stranger unleashes a vengeful spirit that threatens their land and their lives. |
Two timelines intertwine as a modern-day poaching expedition awakens an ancient evil, and a 19th-century fur trapper faces the consequences of his greed. |
Haunted by the loss of his wife, a Crow warrior must confront his own demons and protect his family from a monstrous entity. |
As the American frontier expands, a clash of cultures and beliefs unleashes a supernatural force that will consume all who trespass on sacred ground. |
In 1845 Montana, a Crow elder's attempt to show mercy to a wounded white trapper has unforeseen consequences, setting in motion a generations-long clash between the tribe and the encroaching settlers that culminates in a supernatural reckoning. |
A white fur trapper's quest for vengeance against the Crow tribe who spared his life leads him on a deadly collision course with an ancient, vengeful spirit in the Aspen Grove. |
When a group of white poachers trespass onto sacred Crow land, they incur the wrath of an ancient, eldritch entity, leading to a battle for survival that blurs the lines between man and monster. |
A Crow family's search for a lost loved one in the Aspen Grove unleashes a terrifying primal force, forcing them to confront the dark legacy of their tribe's past dealings with the white settlers. |
In the Montana wilderness, a Crow elder's act of mercy towards a white trespasser sets in motion a supernatural chain of events that will test the strength of his family's bonds and their commitment to the Great Spirit. |
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Explanation: ASPEN GROVE is a horror screenplay with a unique setting and a thought-provoking exploration of cultural conflict. The strengths lie in its atmosphere, character development, and suspense building. However, pacing issues, underdeveloped elements, and an abrupt ending need to be addressed. With revisions, the screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and distinctive horror film.
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Aspen Grove' is a well-crafted, genre-blending narrative that explores the complex dynamics between the Crow tribe and encroaching white settlers in historical Montana. With strong characterization, an engrossing plot structure, and a rich, immersive setting, the screenplay effectively balances elements of drama, thriller, and supernatural horror to create a compelling and thought-provoking story. While the pacing and supporting character development could be further refined, the screenplay's strengths, particularly in its thematic depth and the captivating interactions between the central characters, make it a strong candidate for consideration.