Elvis
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Promo
USP: This script offers a fresh and authentic portrayal of Elvis Presley's life and career, blending nostalgia, emotionality, and historical accuracy. With innovative storytelling techniques, distinctive characters, and unique themes, it explores the complex relationship between Elvis and his enigmatic manager, Colonel Tom Parker, as well as the racial dynamics and societal challenges of the 1950s music industry. The screenplay delves into the internal struggles of Elvis and his family, showcasing his rise to fame, personal relationships, and the pressures of stardom. This compelling storytelling will captivate audiences, offering a unique perspective on the legendary figure of Elvis Presley.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Musical, Biographical, Biography, Biopic, Music, Thriller
Setting: 1950s to 1997, Various locations including Memphis, Tennessee, Las Vegas, Nevada, and Holland
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates strong character development, engaging dialogue, and thematic depth, offering a fresh and compelling perspective on Elvis Presley's life. While it excels in unpredictability, there are opportunities to refine emotional pacing and character relationships for a more impactful narrative.
Themes: Rise to Fame and Legacy, Music and Performance, Business and Management, Identity and Self-Discovery, Race and Culture
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflict is between Elvis and Colonel Tom Parker, as Elvis tries to break free from their contract and Colonel tries to keep him under his control. The stakes are Elvis's career, financial stability, and personal well-being. Other conflicts include Elvis's struggle with addiction, his distant relationship with Priscilla, and his fear of being forgotten.
Overall Mood: Emotional and nostalgic, with moments of tension and conflict
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene Elvis performing on stage, expressing his loneliness and pain: Emotional and somber
- Scene Elvis confronting Colonel Tom Parker about their contract and his financial situation: Tense and conflicted
- Scene Elvis and Priscilla parting ways at the tarmac: Melancholic and nostalgic
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: Exploring the complex relationship between Elvis and his enigmatic manager, Colonel Tom Parker.
- Plot Twist : Revealing Colonel Tom Parker's true identity and the impact it has on Elvis's career and personal life.
- Distinctive Setting : Recreating the iconic locations and time periods of Elvis's rise to fame and subsequent struggles.
- Innovative Idea : Exploring the darker side of fame and the music industry, and the impact it has on Elvis's personal relationships and well-being.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$50-70 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of biographical dramas and music-themed movies
Marketability: The story of Elvis Presley's rise to fame and subsequent struggles is a proven draw for audiences, and the movie's focus on his complex relationship with Colonel Tom Parker adds a unique twist. The movie also features a strong soundtrack and a talented cast, which should generate buzz and attract a wide audience.
The movie explores the darker side of fame and the music industry, which may appeal to fans of gritty biographical dramas. The focus on Elvis's personal relationships and struggles with addiction also adds depth and complexity to the story, making it a compelling watch for audiences interested in more than just the music.
The movie features a talented cast, including a strong lead performance by an actor playing Elvis Presley. The soundtrack is also a major selling point, featuring many of Elvis's classic hits. The movie's marketing campaign will likely emphasize these elements, making it a must-see for fans of Elvis and classic rock and roll.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
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Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay has a very high concept rating, indicating a strong original idea. The emotional impact and character changes also rank highly, suggesting well-developed characters and strong emotional arcs.
- The screenplay scores well in originality and engagement, implying unique and compelling storytelling that keeps the reader invested.
- The plot rating is relatively low, which could indicate room for improvement in the story's structure and pacing. The writer might consider focusing on strengthening the plot progression and ensuring a more balanced build-up of tension and release.
- Formatting and structure scores are lower, suggesting the need to pay attention to industry-standard formatting and the overall structure of the screenplay for better clarity and professional presentation.
The high dialogue and character development percentiles suggest the writer's potential strength in character-driven narratives, while the concept and originality scores indicate a capacity for unique and imaginative storytelling.
Balancing Elements- To create a more balanced screenplay, the writer could focus on developing a stronger plot while maintaining the engaging characters and emotional impact. Additionally, improving formatting and structure can enhance the overall presentation.
- Given the intuitive storytelling abilities, integrating more conscious effort into plot development and structure can create a harmonious blend of compelling characters, engaging dialogue, and a solid narrative backbone.
Based on the data, the writer appears to be more intuitive, with strengths in dialogue, characters, and originality. By incorporating more conscious effort into plot development and structure, they could evolve into an integrated writer.
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay demonstrates strong potential, particularly in originality, emotional impact, and character development. With focused effort on improving plot structure, formatting, and pacing, the writer can elevate the storytelling to an even higher level.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Overall Script | 8.50 | 95 | Interstellar: 8.46 | Erin Brokovich: 8.50 |
Script Originality | 9.25 | 91 | American Hustle: 9.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 9.25 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 8.6 | 91 | The Greatest Showman: 8.5 | Casablanca: 8.6 |
Script Emotional Impact | 8.50 | 90 | Hot Fuzz: 8.25 | fight Club: 8.50 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.5 | 90 | Inception: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
Scene Concept | 8.4 | 88 | The Greatest Showman: 8.3 | fight Club: 8.4 |
Script Theme | 8.75 | 84 | Gran Torino: 8.50 | scream : 8.75 |
Scene Characters | 8.6 | 81 | The Greatest Showman: 8.5 | Casablanca: 8.6 |
Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 76 | Almost Famous: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Scene Overall | 8.5 | 70 | The Greatest Showman: 8.4 | Casablanca: 8.5 |
Scene Originality | 8.86 | 70 | Her: 8.85 | Blade Runner: 8.86 |
Script Visual Impact | 8.25 | 65 | KILLING ZOE: 8.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.25 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.8 | 58 | Gladiator: 7.7 | the dark knight rises: 7.8 |
Script Conflict | 7.75 | 51 | Inception: 7.50 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.75 |
Scene Pacing | 8.31 | 50 | Ghostbusters: 8.30 | Elvis: 8.31 |
Script Structure | 8.00 | 47 | Swingers: 7.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.00 |
Script Characters | 8.25 | 45 | The Hudsucker Proxy: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.02 | 43 | Swingers: 8.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.02 |
Scene Plot | 7.8 | 42 | The Greatest Showman: 7.7 | Erin Brokovich: 7.8 |
Scene Story Forward | 8.0 | 40 | Midsommar: 7.9 | severance (TV): 8.0 |
Script Premise | 7.75 | 39 | Inception: 7.50 | There's something about Mary: 7.75 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.2 | 37 | Poor Things: 7.0 | Requiem for a dream: 7.2 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.3 | 33 | Beetlejuice: 7.2 | Back to the future: 7.3 |
Scene External Goal | 7.07 | 25 | Le souvenir des belles choses: 7.06 | Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 7.07 |
Script Structure | 8.05 | 24 | True Blood: 8.04 | Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 8.05 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.24 | 23 | Passengers: 7.22 | Elvis: 7.24 |
Scene Formatting | 8.02 | 22 | Easy A: 8.01 | Get Out: 8.02 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its blend of nostalgia, emotionality, and authenticity, which is consistently manifested throughout the screenplay.
Best representation: Scene 16 - Promises and Disobedience: The Career of Elvis Presley. Scene 16 effectively captures the writer's unique voice through its bold dialogue, intense emotions, and thematic exploration of identity and rebellion. The sharp and impactful language, coupled with the compelling performances of the actors, brings depth to the characters and drives the narrative forward.
Memorable Lines:
- Colonel Tom Parker: I know what you're thinking... who the hell is this Colonel fellow? (Scene 1)
- Gladys: The Lord gave us music to bring people together. We’re like a family, and family’s the most important thing of all. (Scene 3)
- Elvis: I'd rather be dead, little girl... than to see you with another man. (Scene 4)
- Colonel: To be truly great requires truly great sacrifices. (Scene 8)
- Elvis: I'm just trying to take care of my babies, that’s all I ever cared about! (Scene 5)
- Senator Eastland: The obscenity and vulgarity of this rock and roll music is obviously a means by which the white man and his children can be driven to the level of the Negro! (Scene 11)
- Elvis: I'm so tired of playing Elvis Presley. (Scene 21)
- Colonel: The only thing that matters is that that man... gets on that stage tonight! (Scene 37)
- Elvis: God speed your love... to me! (Scene 42)
Writing Style:
The writing style across the screenplay is characterized by sharp dialogue, intense emotional conflict, and complex character dynamics. The scenes display a blend of dramatic tension, non-linear storytelling, and unique character perspectives.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- Quentin Tarantino
- Cameron Crowe
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
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Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Elvis' is a sprawling and ambitious biopic with strong prose, complex characters, and insightful cultural commentary. However, it suffers from pacing issues, underdeveloped aspects of Elvis' emotional journey, and some repetitive scenes. Further development is needed to tighten the narrative, deepen character exploration, and provide a more satisfying resolution.
- Vivid and evocative prose that effectively captures the energy and atmosphere of Elvis' life and performances. high
- Complex and nuanced portrayal of Colonel Tom Parker, exploring his motivations and contradictions. high
- Exploration of the influence of Black music and culture on Elvis and the cultural context of his rise to fame. high ( Scene 4 Scene 11 Scene 15 )
- Effective use of montage and flashbacks to create a dynamic and engaging narrative structure. medium
- Compelling framing device with the Colonel's perspective in 1997, adding intrigue and suspense. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 38 Scene 39 )
- Overly long screenplay that could benefit from tighter pacing and more focused editing. high
- Elvis' internal conflict and emotional journey could be explored in greater depth, especially in the later sections. high
- Some scenes feel repetitive, particularly the performance sequences and the Colonel's manipulations. medium
- The portrayal of the Memphis Mafia and other supporting characters could be more developed beyond their loyalty to Elvis. medium ( Scene 27 Scene 37 )
- The ending feels somewhat abrupt and could benefit from a more conclusive resolution to the Colonel's story and legacy. low
- Deeper exploration of Elvis' creative process and the evolution of his musical style. high
- More nuanced portrayal of Elvis' relationship with Priscilla, delving into the complexities and challenges beyond his fame. medium
- Greater insight into the Colonel's mysterious past and the reasons for his secretive nature. medium
- Exploration of Elvis' impact on the music industry and his legacy as a cultural icon. low
- The scene at the Hayride effectively captures the raw energy and sexuality of Elvis' early performances and the audience's reaction. high ( Scene 16 Scene 17 )
- The description of Elvis' appearance and stage presence is vivid and memorable. medium ( Scene 22 )
- The scenes at the International Hotel showcase the Colonel's promotional genius and Elvis' creative vision for his comeback. medium ( Scene 30 Scene 31 )
- The press conference scene highlights Elvis' humility and his awareness of the image versus the man. low ( Scene 33 )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.75, The screenplay's premise has a firm foundation, establishing a compelling narrative centered around the enigmatic relationship between Elvis Presley and Colonel Tom Parker, highlighting their influences on defining Elvis' artistry and the industry's impact on his life. While the premise effectively captures the essence of this dynamic, there are opportunities to further refine the narrative, especially in establishing a clearer central conflict and incorporating more thematic depth. See More
Structure: 8.0, The screenplay exhibits a solid foundation in terms of its structure and plot development, effectively engaging the audience with a captivating narrative. However, there are a few areas where refinements could elevate the screenplay's storytelling dynamics, enhancing its impact on the audience. See More
Theme: 8.75, The screenplay effectively explores themes of ambition, exploitation, and the personal toll of fame, using Elvis Presley's journey as a compelling case study. It weaves these themes into the narrative with clarity, depth, and emotional resonance, creating a rich and thought-provoking cinematic experience. See More
Visual Impact: 8.25, This screenplay showcases a range of visual approaches, from large-scale musical performances to intimate family moments, capturing the complexities and dynamics of Elvis Presley's life and career. Its visual style effectively complements the emotional depth of the characters and the epic scope of the story. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.5, The screenplay elicits strong emotional responses through its vivid portrayal of Elvis' struggles and triumphs, the audience is taken on an emotional journey alongside the main characters. The exploration of themes such as identity, family, loyalty, and the transformative power of music adds depth to the narrative. However, the script has the potential to further enhance its emotional impact by refining character relatability, focusing on emotional pacing, and paying attention to emotional complexity and nuances. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes to drive the narrative and captivate the audience. While the central conflict involving Elvis' journey and struggles is well-defined and engaging, there are areas where stakes, integration, resolution, and escalation could be enhanced to strengthen tension and audience involvement. See More
Originality: 9.25, The screenplay showcases originality and creativity in its immersive portrayal of Elvis Presley's journey and the complexities of his relationships. The narrative effectively captures the essence of Elvis's transformative years, balancing authenticity with inventive storytelling techniques. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- The scene starts with Colonel Tom Parker struggling to lift a box of Christmas cards in his apartment in 1997, which leads to his hospitalization. The scene then shifts back in time to the International Hotel during Elvis' performances in the 1970s, showing the crowds, merchandise, and backstage preparations. The main conflict in the scene is between Colonel Parker, who wants Elvis to perform, and the other characters who are concerned about Elvis' health. The conflict is resolved when Vernon Presley ultimately decides to let Elvis perform. The scene ends with Elvis' iconic performance, complete with a white jumpsuit, diamond-encrusted prize-fighter belt, and an American eagle cape.
- At a carnival in 1955, Jimmie Rodgers Snow shares Elvis Presley's record with his colleagues, sparking excitement and curiosity. The Colonel, the carnival's leader, decides to attend a local music event in Shreveport after hearing the record, causing a sudden shift in plans. The scene is filled with a lively and engaging atmosphere as carnival workers pack up for the day.
- The scene takes place at the Shreveport auditorium during the Hayride show. Jimmie Rodgers Snow is singing on stage, while Hank Snow and Diskin observe from the back of the auditorium. Colonel is gathering information from Horace Logan, the founder of the Hayride. A young man, Elvis Presley, is preparing to perform with his band, the Blue Moon Boys. There is tension between Elvis and a country jock named Tommy, who disapproves of Elvis' music. The scene ends with Elvis and his band joining hands with his parents and singing 'Some Glad Morning', despite the conflict and Elvis' nervousness.
- In Shake Rag, 1947, young Elvis Presley and Smoky Bell share a drink from a 'COLORED' water fountain, then are drawn to contrasting sounds of gospel music from a Pentecostal tent and Big Boy Crudup's blues music from a juke joint. Elvis experiences a spiritual moment at the tent, while Smoky heads to the juke joint. The scene shifts to 1955, showing Elvis's family watching his performance at the Hayride auditorium, with Sam Phillips and Marion Keisker discussing his potential. Hank Snow disapproves of his son Jimmie's interest in Elvis's music, creating a tension between sacred and profane music.
- The scene opens with a voice-over from the Old Colonel about Elvis's destiny, showing Elvis in his Crown Electric uniform in Memphis. Elvis's mother, Gladys, expresses anxiety about his sudden fame, while his father, Vernon, discusses Elvis's success over the phone. Elvis serenades his girlfriend, Dixie, with 'Blue Moon' and later shares his excitement about performing with Jimmie Rodgers Snow. The scene concludes with tension at the dinner table as Gladys voices her concerns about Elvis's new career.
- In the Presley apartment, Gladys expresses her fears for Elvis's future as he prepares to leave for his music tour. Elvis reassures his mother with love and alleviates her concerns, and the scene ends with Elvis, Scotty, Vernon, and Billy waving goodbye.
- In this scene, Elvis performs at a concert, receiving both adoration from fans and disapproval from fellow singer Hank. Elvis's provocative performance contrasts with Hank's discomfort, while Colonel sees a business opportunity. Amidst this tension, Elvis struggles to maintain personal relationships and cope with the loneliness of being on the road. The scene ends with Elvis following Colonel into a shadowy world behind the midway, highlighting the uncertain future that awaits him.
- Colonel offers to exclusively represent Elvis, who is conflicted about leaving Hank Snow's tour and ending his relationship with Sam Phillips. The Colonel presents a plan for Elvis' future as a family business, with Vernon as the business manager and Billy as a potential road manager. Elvis' parents express their reservations but ultimately agree to sign the contract, and Elvis ends his relationships with Sam and Hank. The scene takes place at night on a Ferris wheel and in Sun Studios, with a serious and contemplative tone.
- This scene takes place at night on a ferris wheel, followed by flash forwards to Sun Studios and a noir-lit casino in 1997. It includes a conversation between Elvis and Colonel Parker about their dreams and ambitions, leading to the signing of a contract at Sun Studios. The scene also features a montage of Graceland and a somber 1997 flash forward with Old Colonel's voiceover about their success. The tone is nostalgic and reminiscent, with a hint of melancholy. Key dialogue highlights Elvis' desire to provide for his loved ones and Colonel Parker's encouragement of his ambition.
- In this scene, the Colonel introduces Elvis and his family to various merchandise featuring Elvis's face, including cushions, perfume, lipsticks, plaster busts, and pins. The conflict arises when Gladys holds an 'I Hate Elvis' pin, leading to a discussion about hate and its value. However, the conflict is resolved when Elvis pins the pin on his lapel and they all laugh. The scene ends with the Colonel's voiceover discussing Elvis's love for Black music and culture, and a transition to Beale Street in Memphis. The tone of this scene is lighthearted and humorous, with significant visual elements including the unloading of boxes, the explosion of cushions with Elvis's face on them, and the Colonel's demonstration of the merchandise.
- In 1956, Elvis Presley, BB King, and Lansky buy clothes at Lansky Bros. Elvis plans to perform 'Hound Dog' on Milton Berle's show, which is later broadcasted on TV in various locations, including Graceland, Senator Eastland's house, and NBC Studios. The performance sparks controversy due to its vulgarity and racial implications, particularly angering Senator Eastland. The scene shifts to a ghostly Vegas casino in 1997 and various TVs across America, showcasing the performance's impact. The tone evolves from lively to tense, ending with Senator Eastland's outrage and the TV snapping black.
- In 1956, outside the Hudson Theater in New York, a large crowd gathers for the Steve Allen ‘Tonight Show’. Inside, Elvis is rehearsing when the Colonel enters, informing Elvis that he's been replaced by a 'greater' singer. The Colonel presents Elvis with tail suits, insisting he perform in a ‘light-hearted, sophisticated’ manner, without hip movement, to repair his public image. Conflict arises between the Colonel's desire to control Elvis’s image and Elvis' desire to stay true to himself. The scene ends with the Colonel presenting the tail suits and his plan for Elvis' performance.
- In this tense and emotional scene, Elvis performs on the Steve Allen show and is humiliated when he is made to sing to a dog in a top hat. He argues with his bandmates Scotty and Bill about their musical direction, and later gets into a heated argument with his mother Gladys about his career and Colonel Parker's influence. The conflicts are not resolved, and Elvis ultimately storms out of the house in frustration.
- Elvis Presley, driving his purple Cadillac Eldorado, is followed by a black sedan as he leaves Graceland and meets B.B. King. They go to Club Handy on Beale Street to watch Little Richard perform, where Elvis is impressed and wants to record his song and have him on the Steve Allen show. Later, Sister Rosetta Tharpe takes the stage and performs with her electric guitar. The scene ends with Elvis and B.B. joining the audience to watch her perform. The tone is lively and energetic, focusing on the music and performances.
- In this contemplative and tense scene, two shadowy figures observe Elvis and a young girl dancing outside Club Handy. Inside, Elvis, B.B. King, Sister Rosetta, and Little Richard have a late-night gospel session. Elvis expresses his frustration to B.B. about the Colonel's control over his career and new image. Photographer Ernest Withers takes a photo, and the scene ends with a flashbulb and a sinister undertone, leaving Elvis' unanswered question memorialized in his eyes.
- Elvis arrives at Russwood Park, accompanied by Colonel and his family, facing criticism and pressure to conform. In a defiant move, he chooses to stay true to himself, leading to an emotional and intense performance filled with energetic dance moves, causing the crowd to go wild.
- In a nostalgic and regretful scene, Elvis' disobedience towards the Colonel's advice leads to chaotic consequences in 1956. The Colonel reflects on this night in 1997, upset that Elvis didn't listen to him. In 1958, Elvis is forced to choose between joining the army or facing jail time, which could potentially harm his career. The conflicts arise as the Colonel promises to make Elvis a star upon his return from the army, while Gladys expresses her concerns. The scene ends with the discussion of Elvis' enlistment at Graceland in 1958.
- The scene opens with Elvis getting a haircut in 1958, followed by Gladys' collapse at Graceland. In a ghostly Vegas casino in 1997, the Colonel sees Gladys' casket and Elvis crying. Back in 1958, the Presley clan gathers around Gladys' casket. The Colonel consoles Elvis, who is overwhelmed with grief, at Vernon's request. The scene is somber and emotional, with the Colonel helping Vernon deal with his wife's death and Elvis' distress.
- The scene opens in a 1960 press conference where Elvis expresses his ambition to become a dramatic actor. A montage of his 60s films follows, accompanied by his manager's commentary celebrating Elvis' success in Hollywood. The scene also features personal moments, such as Elvis and Priscilla's wedding and the birth of their daughter. The joyous atmosphere is disrupted when Elvis learns about the assassination of Martin Luther King Jr., creating a somber and reflective tone. The main conflict lies in Elvis' desire for a serious acting career and his manager's focus on profitable films, while the tone is nostalgic and contemplative, with moments of happiness and sadness.
- Elvis, while on his bus watching the news of Dr. Martin Luther King Jr.'s assassination, is informed that he is needed on set for a Christmas TV special, 'Elvis Presley's Wonderful World of Christmas'. This special is sponsored by Singer sewing machines with profit participation. The Colonel and Vernon are excited about the idea, but Elvis is not, as he wants to focus on being a serious actor. Priscilla is upset seeing the riots in Memphis on a portable TV. Jerry questions the Colonel's plan, which leads to a confrontation with Elvis, ending with Elvis slamming into the Vista-Liner.
- Elvis returns to his bus after an argument with Charlie about the Colonel's plans for his career. Jerry informs him that he's been offered a job in LA and is leaving. Elvis, at a loss, tries to make amends by offering to buy Jerry a new car. Meanwhile, Charlie enters with a tape recorder to play a promotion tape for a Singer special, which Elvis approves. Priscilla joins Elvis to watch the Reverend's funeral, offering him a moment of comfort and a chance to escape his fame. The scene is emotional and tense, with conflicts around Elvis's career and Jerry's departure that are not fully resolved.
- The scene takes place at NBC Studios during the day, where Elvis expresses his fear of performing in front of a live audience. Priscilla encourages him, and he eventually takes the stage. Meanwhile, Colonel Parker and the Singer executives discuss the planned Christmas numbers in the control room. The scene ends with Elvis beginning his performance, resolving his fear and the clash with the Singer executives' plans.
- In this scene, the Dance Captain leads a group of Dancing Santas in a corridor, while at NBC Studios, Elvis performs on stage, singing hits like 'Hound Dog' and 'Jailhouse Rock'. The Colonel, who had planned for a Christmas-themed performance, is upset and leaves in a fury when he sees Scotty Moore and D.J. Fontana, the Blue Moon Boys, on stage. Elvis performs 'Trying to Get to You' while staring at Priscilla, and the Colonel watches from the shadows, realizing he's been conspired against. The main conflict in this scene is between the Colonel and Elvis, and it remains unresolved as the Colonel leaves. The emotional tone of this scene is one of excitement from Elvis' performance and tension from the Colonel's reaction.
- In the NBC studios during the day, Colonel angrily demands that Binder play 'Here Comes Santa Claus' after 'Elvis Talks'. However, on stage, Elvis decides to talk about music instead, mentioning his influence and other bands like the Beatles. He also shares stories about keeping his little finger still during a performance in Memphis, causing the band and audience to laugh. Elvis expresses his excitement about being able to do what he wants in this TV special, standing up to Colonel's domineering control. The tone is lighthearted and playful, with a touch of defiance.
- In this emotional and tense scene from Elvis' comeback special, Elvis performs at the NBC studios while the Colonel watches from a ghostly casino in Vegas, fearing a breach of contract. Elvis reflects on his lost loved ones and the recent Robert Kennedy assassination, causing a conflict with the Colonel. The scene ends with Elvis determined to make a statement and the Colonel storming out.
- In this scene, Binder, Elvis, Bones, and Billy Goldenberg collaborate on a new song for 'Here Comes Santa Claus' at the NBC studios' control room and dressing room at night. The Colonel initially opposes the new song but changes his mind when he hears it. The scene ends with Elvis's inspiring performance of the new song on stage during the day, with the approval of the cast and Colonel. The main conflict is the Colonel's opposition, which is resolved when he hears the song. The emotional tone is hopeful and triumphant, with significant dialogue including Elvis's quote and the Colonel's exclamation. The visual elements include the Santa set, abandoned studio floor, and Elvis performing on stage.
- The scene is set in the Graceland dining room, where everyone is in high spirits due to the success of Elvis' new song 'In The Ghetto'. Elvis and Priscilla hand out jewelry boxes as a surprise gift, but Vernon, Elvis' father, expresses his concerns about the tour's finances, causing a tense moment. The group then records new music in the Jungle Room. Charlie receives a call from the Colonel, which Priscilla advises against answering. The scene ends with Elvis deciding to confront the Colonel in Vegas, setting the stage for potential conflict.
- In a 1969 hospital room, Colonel, still recovering from a heart attack, watches a memory of a young woman from a past Christmas special. Elvis pays a visit, expressing his concern for Colonel's health, but Colonel downplays his condition. Despite Colonel's attempts to convince Elvis to continue their professional relationship, Elvis decides it's time to part ways in terms of business. This emotional scene highlights the conflict between Colonel's desire to manage Elvis's career and Elvis's determination to move on, leaving Colonel looking hurt as the scene concludes.
- In the showroom of the International Hotel in Las Vegas, Elvis and his manager, the Colonel, discuss the challenges of Elvis' upcoming international tour. The Colonel encourages Elvis to overcome his fear of performing in large venues, leading to a shared moment of excitement as they envision the success of the tour. The main conflict of Elvis' fear is resolved through the Colonel's support and the allocation of necessary resources for a grand sound. The scene concludes with the pair enthusiastically planning the tour and the spectacular show.
- Colonel supervises the installation of promotional materials for Elvis' concert, including a massive marquee and stuffed hound dogs. Inside, Elvis practices with his band, refining his distinctive singing and karate moves. The Colonel convenes with significant figures to observe the rehearsal. The scene concludes with Elvis ascending the stage and commencing a song.
- In this scene, Elvis delivers a captivating split-screen duet performance with his younger self and Big Boy Cruddup, leaving the audience in awe. Simultaneously, the Colonel negotiates a lucrative long-term contract for Elvis's performances at the International Hotel with Kohn and Goochera. The Colonel drives a hard bargain, demanding a $500,000-per-engagement fee for five years, unlimited credit at the hotel, and the right to sell merchandise. Amidst the excitement, concerns about Elvis's security arise due to death threats, leading to discussions between the Colonel and Diskin. The scene concludes with the Colonel securing favorable terms for Elvis, while also addressing his safety.
- The scene opens with a flash forward of a threatening note outside Elvis' room, then cuts to Elvis performing 'Suspicious Minds' in the present. A future flash forward shows Elvis fighting on stage during 'Never Been to Spain', followed by his return to the show. Elvis finishes 'Suspicious Minds' to a rapturous applause, while struggling to balance his personal and professional life. The main conflict is not directly resolved, but Elvis' performance suggests he's dealing with it. The tone is intense and emotional, with a mix of fear, aggression, and adoration. Key dialogue includes Elvis' threat to 'whoop' someone's ass, Priscilla's realization that she's never seen Elvis perform live, and Vernon's pride in his son. Significant visual elements include the threatening note, Elvis' on-stage fight, and his connection with the audience and Colonel.
- In this upbeat and friendly scene, Elvis Presley holds a post-show press conference at the International Hotel, where he is asked about his longevity, image, and personal life. He expresses a desire to perform in Europe and Japan, and Lord Sutch offers him a large sum to perform in England. Elvis humorously interacts with the reporters, and introduces Fats Domino as the real 'King of Rock and Roll', creating a memorable and heartfelt moment.
- Colonel and Jerry discuss setting up shop at the International Hotel, while Elvis talks to Priscilla about his absence and busy schedule. Elvis's fear of being killed escalates when he finds a showroom menu outside his door with a threatening message. The scene is filled with tension, conflict, and fear, as Colonel's decision and Elvis's paranoia create a rift between them.
- The scene starts with the removal of Elvis's sign from the International Hotel marquee, foreshadowing his waning fame. Inside a hospital room, Elvis, pressured by the Colonel, decides to perform despite threats, leading to a 15-city American tour with heightened security. Amidst the concert, Elvis performs 'Burning Love' backed by a presidential-scale motorcade and police officers. Post-performance, Elvis is injected with medication in his limo. The scene concludes with Priscilla announcing her departure from Elvis at Graceland, citing his drug use and neglect, creating tension and emotional distress.
- Priscilla confronts Elvis about their distant relationship, leading to a heartbreaking confirmation of their marriage's end at Graceland. Simultaneously, Jerry discusses his concerns about Elvis's health and the Colonel's decisions regarding Elvis's career with Tom Diskin in the Colonel’s suite at the International Hotel. The scene is filled with emotional intensity, sadness, and anger, resulting in Priscilla leaving Elvis and Jerry storming out of the Colonel’s suite.
- Jerry finds a letter from a Dutch fan, Theo Jr., addressed to Colonel Tom Parker, triggering flashbacks revealing Parker's Dutch origins and decision to leave. In 1974, Jerry reveals to Elvis that Parker has no identity or citizenship, causing Elvis to collapse. The Memphis Mafia and medical staff attend to Elvis, while Parker insists he must perform. The scene ends with Vernon asking Dr. Nick for help, leaving the outcome uncertain.
- Inside the International Hotel's showroom, Elvis performs a ballad, receiving applause. He addresses the audience, accusing high-rollers and Colonel Parker of being aliens and keeping him hostage due to his drug-addled state. Colonel tries to stop the show, but Elvis, in a demonic rage, fires him, causing shock and laughter. The conflict remains unresolved, with Colonel looking grave and planning to review contracts. The scene is emotionally intense, with moments of humor, shock, and confusion.
- In a Ghostly Vegas casino of 1997, Old Colonel reflects on his past acts of 'kindness' towards a carnival performer, now an alcoholic. Meanwhile, he fires Dr. Nick and starts dictating Presley Enterprises' expenses. Simultaneously, Elvis and his team prepare to leave the hotel, but Vernon stays behind to discuss their financial obligations to Colonel Tom Parker. The conversation escalates into a heated argument, resulting in Elvis storming out, leaving their issues unresolved.
- In this intense scene, Elvis confronts Colonel in an elevator in the parking garage of the International Hotel. Accusing Colonel of bleeding him dry and calling him a phony, Elvis expresses his desire to break free from their contract. Colonel, in turn, reminds Elvis of their shared history and understanding, and offers to step down as his manager. The conflicted Elvis looks on as Colonel walks away, leaving him to consider his options as the opening notes of 'Are You Lonesome Tonight?' play in the background.
- The scene opens with Elvis singing 'Are You Lonesome Tonight?' in his hotel room, conveying his emotional pain and fear of being forgotten to his father, Vernon. Years later, Vernon is seen with Priscilla and Lisa Marie in a limo, where Elvis and Priscilla share a heart-to-heart conversation about his health and well-being. Priscilla suggests a healing clinic for him, but Elvis expresses his lack of dreams and motivation, leaving her concern unresolved. The scene takes place in two different settings, with the main conflict being Elvis's emotional pain and fear of being forgotten. The tone is melancholic and somber, with key pieces of dialogue including Elvis's desire to go back to the way things were and Priscilla's suggestion of a healing clinic.
- Elvis and Priscilla part ways at a plane, with Elvis mouthing 'I will always love you' as 'Separate Ways' plays. In 1997, the Old Colonel reflects on Elvis' death, his efforts to keep Elvis' memory alive, and the impact of Elvis' love for his audience, as flashbacks to Elvis' final concert showcase his powerful voice despite his physical state. The scene ends with the announcer declaring 'Elvis has left the building' and a flatline beep, implying Elvis' death. The main conflicts include Elvis' struggle with his health and the end of his relationship with Priscilla, which are not resolved. The tone is emotional and nostalgic, with a sense of loss and longing.
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Character Scotty Moore
Description Scotty's outburst at the Steve Allen Show seems out of character. He is typically portrayed as calm and collected, and his sudden anger feels unjustified and driven by the plot's need for conflict.
( Scene 7 (3) )
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Description The source and nature of the death threats against Elvis are never fully explained. While the Colonel uses them as a justification to keep Elvis in Vegas, their origin and credibility remain unclear.
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Description The explanation for Colonel Tom Parker's inability to leave the country due to his mysterious past and lack of documentation is introduced very late in the story. This revelation feels like a convenient plot device to trap Elvis in Vegas.
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Description The carnies' use of a specific dialect with exaggerated pronunciation feels stereotypical and inauthentic.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Colonel Tom Parker | Colonel Tom Parker starts off as a master promoter and showman, using his skills to hide his inner turmoil. As the story progresses, he is revealed to be a shrewd and ambitious music manager who sees potential in Elvis Presley. However, his true nature as a manipulative and calculating character is exposed, leading to his firing by Elvis. This event forces Colonel to reflect on his actions and emotional connection to Elvis, ultimately leading to a deeper understanding of their complex relationship and his own vulnerabilities. | The character arc for Colonel Tom Parker is well-developed, showcasing his evolution from a master promoter to a manipulative manager with a complex relationship with Elvis. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal struggles and emotional depth throughout the screenplay to further enhance his character development. | To improve the character arc for Colonel Tom Parker, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into his inner turmoil, regrets, and vulnerabilities. Show moments of introspection and reflection that highlight his emotional complexity and internal conflicts. Additionally, explore his motivations and desires in greater detail to provide a deeper understanding of his actions and decisions. |
Elvis Presley | Elvis Presley's character arc in the screenplay follows his journey from a young, nervous performer seeking validation to a confident and charismatic star challenging societal norms with his music. Throughout the feature, Elvis grapples with the pressures of fame, his own identity, and the sacrifices he made for his art. He undergoes a transformation from vulnerability and uncertainty to strength and resilience, ultimately finding a balance between his personal struggles and his passion for music. | The character arc for Elvis Presley is well-developed and captures the complexity of his persona. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal conflicts and emotional journey to add depth to his character. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth could enhance the overall narrative and provide a richer context for his development. | To improve the character arc for Elvis Presley, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into his inner turmoil and emotional struggles. Show more interactions with other characters that reveal different facets of his personality and relationships. Additionally, explore his growth and transformation in a more nuanced way, highlighting the internal conflicts and external challenges he faces throughout the feature. |
Colonel | The Colonel starts off as a controlling and manipulative figure, prioritizing profit over Elvis's artistic integrity. As the story progresses, he begins to show vulnerability and regret, realizing the impact of his actions on Elvis. He ultimately learns to let go of his control and support Elvis in pursuing his own path, leading to a more collaborative and caring relationship between them. | The character arc for the Colonel is well-developed, showing a gradual shift from manipulation to vulnerability and ultimately to support for Elvis. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and motivations, as well as more exploration of his relationship with Elvis beyond just the business aspect. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into the Colonel's backstory and personal motivations for controlling Elvis. Show more moments of conflict and resolution between the Colonel and Elvis to highlight their evolving relationship. Additionally, explore the Colonel's vulnerabilities and regrets in more detail to make his character more relatable and sympathetic to the audience. |
Elvis | Elvis's character arc in the screenplay follows his journey from a conflicted young artist struggling with external pressures to a defiant and determined musician who breaks free from the constraints of the industry and asserts his artistic identity. Throughout the feature, Elvis grapples with his inner turmoil, confronts his fears and insecurities, and ultimately finds the courage to pursue his passion for music on his own terms, leading to personal growth and self-discovery. | The character arc for Elvis is well-developed and engaging, showcasing his internal struggles and growth throughout the feature. However, there could be more emphasis on his relationships with other characters, such as Priscilla and the Colonel, to add depth and complexity to his journey. Additionally, exploring Elvis's emotional journey in more nuanced ways, beyond his conflicts with fame and artistic integrity, could further enhance the character's development. | To improve the character arc for Elvis, consider delving deeper into his relationships with Priscilla and the Colonel, highlighting the emotional impact of these connections on his journey. Additionally, explore Elvis's vulnerabilities and insecurities in more nuanced ways, showcasing the complexity of his character beyond his struggles with fame and artistic freedom. Adding moments of introspection and personal growth can further enhance the depth and authenticity of Elvis's arc in the screenplay. |
Gladys | Gladys starts off as a protective and traditional mother who struggles to understand Elvis's dreams. As the story progresses, she becomes more anxious and emotionally fragile, deeply concerned about her son's future and the impact of fame on their family. Despite her fears, she learns to support Elvis in pursuing his dreams while still maintaining her protective nature. By the end of the screenplay, Gladys comes to terms with the realities of Elvis's career and finds a balance between her maternal instincts and her son's aspirations. | The character arc for Gladys is well-developed and allows for growth and change throughout the screenplay. However, it could benefit from more specific moments of conflict and resolution to highlight her internal struggles and development. Additionally, providing more insight into Gladys's backstory and motivations could further enhance her character arc. | To improve the character arc for Gladys, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into her past experiences and how they have shaped her protective nature. Show more moments of conflict between Gladys and Elvis that force her to confront her fears and anxieties. Additionally, explore how Gladys's relationship with Elvis evolves over time, showcasing moments of growth and understanding between them. |
Colonel Parker | Colonel Parker starts off as a protective and charismatic manager, making tough decisions for Elvis's career. However, as the story progresses, his manipulative and controlling nature becomes more prominent as he prioritizes financial gain over artistic integrity. This leads to a power struggle with Elvis as the singer seeks independence and challenges the Colonel's authority. | The character arc for Colonel Parker is well-developed, showcasing his evolution from a protective manager to a manipulative figure focused on financial gain. However, the arc could benefit from more internal conflict and exploration of the Colonel's motivations for prioritizing profit over Elvis's artistic vision. This would add depth to the character and make his actions more understandable to the audience. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes that delve into Colonel Parker's past and reveal the reasons behind his relentless pursuit of success. Show moments of vulnerability or doubt to humanize the character and create empathy from the audience. Additionally, explore the dynamic between Colonel Parker and Elvis in more depth, highlighting the complexities of their relationship and the emotional impact of their power struggle. |
Vernon | Vernon starts off as a pragmatic father figure focused on the financial stability of the family and the practical aspects of Elvis's career. As the story progresses, he becomes more conflicted and emotionally torn between his loyalty to Elvis and the harsh reality of their financial troubles. Ultimately, he must confront his past mistakes and make difficult decisions to protect his son and secure their future. | The character arc for Vernon is well-developed and provides a compelling emotional journey for the audience. However, there could be more opportunities to explore Vernon's internal struggles and emotional depth throughout the screenplay. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on his relationship with Elvis and how it evolves over time. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into Vernon's internal conflicts and emotional turmoil. Show more interactions between Vernon and Elvis that highlight their complex relationship and how it changes over the course of the story. This will help to further develop Vernon's character and provide a more nuanced portrayal of his journey. |
Priscilla | Priscilla starts off as a source of hope and comfort for Elvis, providing stability and support in his life. As their relationship progresses, she becomes more assertive in advocating for Elvis's artistic ambitions while also prioritizing their family's well-being. However, as their marriage faces challenges and emotional distance grows, Priscilla reaches a breaking point and confronts Elvis about their failing relationship, ultimately making the difficult decision to leave. | The character arc for Priscilla is well-developed, showing her evolution from a supportive partner to a strong-willed individual who stands up for her own needs. However, there could be more emphasis on Priscilla's internal struggles and emotional journey throughout the screenplay to further deepen her character development. | To improve the character arc for Priscilla, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into her emotions and internal conflicts as she navigates the challenges in her relationship with Elvis. Show more of Priscilla's vulnerabilities and complexities to make her character more relatable and multidimensional to the audience. |
Jerry | Jerry starts off as a loyal and concerned friend to Elvis, mediating between him and the Colonel. As the story progresses, Jerry uncovers a shocking truth about Colonel Tom Parker's identity, leading him to become more determined and straightforward in his approach to protect Elvis. Ultimately, Jerry's loyalty and protective nature drive him to take bold actions to ensure Elvis' well-being and expose the truth about the Colonel. | The character arc for Jerry is well-developed, but it could benefit from more internal conflict or personal growth to make his journey more compelling. Additionally, his role in the story could be further expanded to give him more agency and impact on the plot. | To improve the character arc for Jerry, consider adding moments of internal struggle or moral dilemmas that challenge his loyalty to Elvis and force him to make difficult decisions. Give Jerry more agency in the story by having him take more proactive steps to protect Elvis and confront the Colonel. This will make his character more dynamic and engaging for the audience. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Rise to Fame and Legacy | Depiction of Elvis' journey from a young boy in Shake Rag to an international superstar, his influence on music and culture, and the lasting impact of his legacy. | The screenplay heavily focuses on Elvis' rise to fame, showcasing his early influences, his struggles with fame, and his eventual transformation into a cultural icon. It also highlights the legacy he left behind, both in terms of his music and his influence on future generations. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Rise to Fame and Legacy:
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Music and Performance | Elvis' passion for music, his unique performance style, and the impact of his music on various audiences throughout his career. | The screenplay frequently showcases Elvis' musical talent and his innovative performance style, highlighting how his music evolved over time and the various influences that shaped his sound. It also explores the reactions of different audiences to his music, from adoration to controversy. | ||||||||||||
Business and Management | Elvis' relationship with his manager, Colonel Tom Parker, and the business aspects of his career, including contracts, merchandising, and finances. | The screenplay touches upon the complex relationship between Elvis and Colonel Tom Parker, shedding light on the business decisions made throughout his career and the impact they had on his personal life and finances. It also explores the role of music executives and the marketing of Elvis' image. | ||||||||||||
Identity and Self-Discovery | Elvis' struggle to maintain his identity amidst fame, his exploration of various music genres, and his quest for personal fulfillment. | The screenplay delves into Elvis' struggle to maintain his authenticity and identity as he becomes increasingly famous, highlighting his exploration of different music genres and his desire to be taken seriously as an actor. It also touches upon his personal relationships and the impact of fame on his sense of self. | ||||||||||||
Race and Culture | Elvis' exposure to Black music and culture, and the influence it had on his own music and performance style. | The screenplay briefly touches upon the influence of Black music and culture on Elvis' own music and performance style, highlighting the impact of artists like Big Boy Crudup and Sister Rosetta Tharpe on his career. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to navigate the complexities of fame, identity, and personal fulfillment while staying true to himself and his ambitions. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to ensure that Elvis gets on stage and performs despite his health issues and maintain the show to keep the audience entertained. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the tension between artistic integrity and commercial success, challenging the protagonist's beliefs and values about authenticity, success, and personal fulfillment. |
Character Development Contribution: The evolving internal and external goals provide a platform for the protagonist's growth, navigating personal challenges, identity crises, and loyalty dilemmas. The philosophical conflict challenges the protagonist's beliefs and values, leading to introspection and character development.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative forward, creating tension, dramatic moments, and character arcs. They establish a clear direction for the protagonist's journey and weave together various subplots to create a cohesive storyline.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts explore themes of authenticity, identity, family, success, and artistic integrity. They add depth to the narrative, highlighting the complexities of the entertainment industry, personal relationships, and the pursuit of one's dreams amidst external pressures and expectations.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Colonel Parker's Dilemma: Balancing Elvis' Health and His Fans' Expectations | Reflective, Confessional, Nostalgic, Regretful | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Discovery of Elvis Presley's Music and a Spontaneous Decision | Serious, Nostalgic, Excited | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Tension Builds as Elvis Prepares to Perform on the Hayride Show | Nostalgic, Hopeful, Intimate, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | |
4 - Young Elvis's Musical Awakening and 1955 Performance | Intense, Emotional, Dramatic, Nostalgic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Elvis's Rise to Fame: Excitement and Anxiety | Tense, Anxious, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Elvis's Tender Moment with His Mother before Leaving for Tour | Anxious, Reassuring, Nostalgic, Conflicted | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Elvis's Dilemma: Artistic Expression vs. Personal Values | Intense, Reflective, Nostalgic, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Elvis' New Journey: The Colonel's Offer and a Family Business | Reflective, Serious, Nostalgic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Elvis' Rise to Fame: Dreams, Ambition, and Success | Nostalgic, Hopeful, Reflective, Dreamy | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Elvis's Face Everywhere: A Lighthearted Look at Fame and Merchandise | Nostalgic, Reflective, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Elvis' Provocative Performance and the Public Outcry | Intense, Raw, Rage, Disturbed, Revulsion | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - The Colonel's Plan: Repairing Elvis' Public Image | Somber, Reflective, Serious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Elvis' Humiliating Performance and Family Conflicts | Humiliation, Defensiveness, Despondency, Family Conflict | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Elvis Presley Meets Little Richard and Sister Rosetta Tharpe at Club Handy | Excitement, Nostalgia, Celebration | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Elvis' Frustration and a Sinister Undertone | Menacing, Reflective, Sinister | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Elvis's Defiant Performance at Russwood Park | Defiant, Rebellious, Energetic, Defiant, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Promises and Disobedience: The Career of Elvis Presley | Tense, Emotional, Dramatic, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Elvis' Grief and The Colonel's Consolation | Emotional, Reflective, Intimate | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Elvis' Hollywood Dreams and Reality: A Reflective Journey | Nostalgic, Reflective, Regretful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Elvis's Discontent: A Christmas Special Instead of Serious Acting | Dramatic, Reflective, Serious, Tense, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - Elvis's Career Frustrations and Jerry's Departure | Reflective, Introspective, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Elvis Overcomes Fear and Takes the Stage | Tense, Nervous, Insecure, Controlled, Confused | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Elvis' Unexpected Performance and the Colonel's Fury | Energetic, Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Elvis Defies Colonel's Control in TV Special | Reflective, Nostalgic, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Elvis' Emotional Comeback Special Performance and the Colonel's Betrayal | Tense, Emotional, Defiant, Confrontational | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
26 - Elvis's New Song: A Triumph at NBC Studios | Defiant, Reflective, Hopeful, Despairing | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Celebration, Gifts, and Tense Concerns at Graceland followed by a Bold Decision in Vegas | Emotional, Reflective, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - The Parting of Ways: Elvis and Colonel's Business Relationship Comes to an End | Reflective, Regretful, Nostalgic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Elvis and the Colonel's Exciting Tour Preparations | Intimate, Creative, Exciting, Collaborative | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | |
30 - Colonel's Marketing Efforts and Elvis' Energetic Rehearsal | Energetic, Emotional, Dramatic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Elvis's Explosive Performance and High-Stakes Contract Negotiations | Intense, Chilling, Exciting, Reflective | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Elvis' Intense Performance Amid Personal Struggles | Intense, Emotional, Dramatic, Reflective, Triumphant | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Elvis Presley's Post-Show Press Conference at the International Hotel: A Night of Reflection, Humor, and Camaraderie | Reflective, Humorous, Nostalgic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
34 - Colonel's Decision and Elvis's Paranoia | Paranoia, Fear, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - Elvis's Continued Performances Amidst Threats and Personal Struggles | Tense, Emotional, Defiant, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Confrontations and Emotional Revelations at Graceland and the International Hotel | Emotional, Intense, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Revelations and Crisis: Jerry's Discovery and Elvis' Collapse | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Elvis' Drug-Fueled Rant: Accusations and Firing of Colonel Parker | Dramatic, Emotional, Intense, Humorous | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - The Financial Breakdown: A Refusal and a Storm Out | Tense, Emotional, Defiant | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - Confrontation and Resolution: Elvis and Colonel's Parking Garage Showdown | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational, Reflective | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - Elvis's Loneliness and Fear of Oblivion: A Melancholic Conversation with Priscilla | Heartbroken, Reflective, Emotional, Defeated | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Farewell to the King: Elvis' Final Moments and Legacy | Reflective, Emotional, Nostalgic, Tragic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Emotional depth, character development, powerful themes, and memorable performance by Elvis
- Innovative storytelling through visual and mimed elements
- Engaging dialogue and character dynamics
- Compelling conflict and controversy with intense emotional impact
- Effective portrayal of internal conflict with strong character dynamics and tension-filled atmosphere
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited focus on external conflict
- Some cliched moments and dialogues
- Potential pacing issues and lack of external action
- Possible confusion for the audience due to complex revelations and flashbacks
- Lack of in-depth exploration of certain characters and potential conflicts
Suggestions
- Increase the focus on external conflict and exploration of potential conflicts and obstacles to enhance the tension and stakes
- Re-evaluate cliched moments and dialogues to ensure they contribute to the story and character development rather than detract from them
- Consider pacing and external action in the transitions between emotional beats to maintain engagement and momentum
- Clarify complex revelations and flashbacks for the audience to avoid confusion and enhance their understanding
- Expand the exploration of certain characters and conflicts to enhance the complexity and nuance of the story
- Physical environment: The screenplay takes place in various locations, including Las Vegas, Memphis, Shreveport, and a carnival in the 1950s. These settings showcase the glitz and glamour of entertainment venues, the grittiness of carnivals, and the intimacy of homes and hotel rooms. The physical environment is often used to contrast the public and private lives of the characters, highlighting the pressures and expectations of fame.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay include Southern hospitality, showmanship, country music, racial tensions, and the emergence of rock and roll. These cultural aspects shape the characters' experiences and actions, as they navigate the complexities of the music industry and societal expectations. The cultural elements also contribute to the narrative and thematic depth of the screenplay, exploring themes of identity, authenticity, and the cost of fame.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is influenced by the music industry, family dynamics, and racial tensions. The characters' experiences and actions are shaped by their roles within these structures, as they navigate power dynamics, personal relationships, and societal expectations. The societal structure contributes to the narrative and thematic depth of the screenplay, exploring themes of exploitation, loyalty, and the impact of fame on personal relationships.
- Technology: The technological elements in the screenplay include portable record players, live radio broadcasting, television, and recording studios. These technological aspects shape the characters' experiences and actions, as they use technology to further their careers and communicate with their audiences. The technological elements also contribute to the narrative and thematic depth of the screenplay, exploring themes of commercialization, mass communication, and the impact of technology on the music industry.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by providing both opportunities and challenges. The characters navigate these elements to achieve their goals, form relationships, and maintain their identities in the face of fame and public scrutiny.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by providing context, conflict, and resolution. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology create a rich backdrop for the characters' stories, highlighting the complexities of the music industry and the impact of fame on personal relationships.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of identity, authenticity, exploitation, loyalty, commercialization, mass communication, and the impact of technology on the music industry. These themes are woven throughout the screenplay, providing a nuanced and thought-provoking narrative.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by its blend of nostalgia, emotionality, and authenticity, which is consistently manifested throughout the screenplay. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's unique style contributes to the script by enhancing the emotional depth of the narrative, capturing the internal struggles of the characters, and providing a sense of historical accuracy and cultural context. |
Best Representation Scene | 16 - Elvis's Defiant Performance at Russwood Park |
Best Scene Explanation | Scene 16 effectively captures the writer's unique voice through its bold dialogue, intense emotions, and thematic exploration of identity and rebellion. The sharp and impactful language, coupled with the compelling performances of the actors, brings depth to the characters and drives the narrative forward. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
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Strong Emotional Impact and High Stakes | Scenes with a high emotional impact tend to also have high stakes, indicating that the emotional intensity is often tied to the importance of the outcome for the characters. |
Reflective Tone and Character Changes | Scenes with a reflective tone often lead to significant character changes, suggesting that moments of introspection and self-awareness drive character development. |
Intense Conflict and Dramatic Dialogue | Scenes with intense conflict tend to have dramatic dialogue, highlighting the heightened emotions and tension between characters during confrontations. |
Nostalgic Concept and Reflective Plot | Scenes with a nostalgic concept often feature a reflective plot, indicating a focus on past experiences and memories that shape the characters' present actions and decisions. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases the writer's talent for creating engaging characters, emotional depth, and thematic complexity. The non-linear storytelling and introspective moments add depth to the characters and themes, while the blend of music, visuals, and dialogue creates a compelling narrative.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Save the Cat by Blake Snyder | This book offers valuable insights into structuring scenes, developing characters, and crafting engaging narratives, which can help enhance scene structure, pacing, and character development in the screenplay. |
Screenplay | Walk the Line by Gill Dennis and James Mangold | Studying this screenplay can help the writer improve historical accuracy, character development, and emotional depth in scenes, particularly those depicting real-life musicians and their struggles in the industry. |
Exercise | Write a scene with conflicting internal and external goals for a character, exploring the impact of personal struggles on their professional life.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise can help deepen the emotional resonance and authenticity of character interactions in a screenplay, enhancing character relationships and overall storytelling. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Rags to Riches | Elvis rises from a humble background in Memphis to become a successful musician and cultural icon. | Rags to Riches is a classic tale of a character who starts off poor and unknown but eventually achieves wealth, fame, and success through their talents and hard work. Examples include Cinderella and Aladdin. To subvert this trope, the character could choose to reject fame and fortune in favor of a simpler life. |
Mentor Archetype | Colonel Tom Parker serves as a mentor to Elvis, guiding his career and helping him achieve success. | The Mentor Archetype is a common trope in stories where an experienced and wise character takes a younger, less experienced character under their wing and helps them grow and develop. Examples include Obi-Wan Kenobi in Star Wars and Dumbledore in Harry Potter. To subvert this trope, the mentor could turn out to be a fraud or have ulterior motives. |
The Trickster | Colonel Tom Parker is a trickster figure, using his cunning and deceit to manipulate situations and achieve his goals. | The Trickster is a common trope in stories where a character uses their wit and cunning to outsmart others and achieve their goals. Examples include Loki in Marvel Comics and the Joker in Batman. To subvert this trope, the trickster could be revealed to have a heart of gold or be working towards a greater good. |
Coming of Age | Elvis' journey from a young, unknown musician to a cultural icon can be seen as a coming of age story. | Coming of Age is a common trope in stories where a character goes through a series of challenges and experiences that help them grow and develop into a mature adult. Examples include The Breakfast Club and Stand By Me. To subvert this trope, the character could reject the trappings of adulthood and choose to remain childlike. |
The Hero's Journey | Elvis' journey from obscurity to fame and success can be seen as a hero's journey. | The Hero's Journey is a common trope in stories where a character goes on a journey, faces challenges and obstacles, and eventually emerges victorious. Examples include Star Wars and The Lord of the Rings. To subvert this trope, the character could fail in their quest or choose to abandon it altogether. |
The Fallen Hero | Elvis' struggles with addiction and his declining health can be seen as a fallen hero story. | The Fallen Hero is a common trope in stories where a character who was once successful and admired falls from grace due to their own flaws or circumstances beyond their control. Examples include Citizen Kane and The Godfather. To subvert this trope, the character could overcome their flaws and regain their former status. |
The Star-Crossed Lovers | Elvis and Priscilla's relationship can be seen as a star-crossed lovers story. | The Star-Crossed Lovers is a common trope in stories where two characters are in love but are prevented from being together due to circumstances beyond their control. Examples include Romeo and Juliet and The Phantom of the Opera. To subvert this trope, the characters could overcome the obstacles and be together in the end. |
The Tragic Hero | Elvis' eventual death can be seen as a tragic hero story. | The Tragic Hero is a common trope in stories where a character who is admired and respected meets a tragic end due to their own flaws or circumstances beyond their control. Examples include Hamlet and Macbeth. To subvert this trope, the character could survive and learn from their mistakes. |
The Chosen One | Elvis is often portrayed as a chosen one, destined for greatness. | The Chosen One is a common trope in stories where a character is chosen by fate or destiny to achieve greatness. Examples include Harry Potter and Neo in The Matrix. To subvert this trope, the character could reject their destiny and choose their own path. |
The Fallen Mentor | Colonel Tom Parker's declining health and eventual death can be seen as a fallen mentor story. | The Fallen Mentor is a common trope in stories where a character who was once successful and respected falls from grace due to circumstances beyond their control. Examples include Dumbledore in Harry Potter and Obi-Wan Kenobi in Star Wars. To subvert this trope, the character could overcome their circumstances and regain their former status. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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1 | Colonel Tom Parker: I know what you're thinking... who the hell is this Colonel fellow? |
3 | Gladys: The Lord gave us music to bring people together. We’re like a family, and family’s the most important thing of all. |
4 | Elvis: I'd rather be dead, little girl... than to see you with another man. |
8 | Colonel: To be truly great requires truly great sacrifices. |
5 | Elvis: I'm just trying to take care of my babies, that’s all I ever cared about! |
11 | Senator Eastland: The obscenity and vulgarity of this rock and roll music is obviously a means by which the white man and his children can be driven to the level of the Negro! |
21 | Elvis: I'm so tired of playing Elvis Presley. |
37 | Colonel: The only thing that matters is that that man... gets on that stage tonight! |
42 | Elvis: God speed your love... to me! |
Some Loglines to consider:
A charismatic young Elvis Presley's life is forever changed when he meets Colonel Tom Parker, a shrewd promoter who guides him to superstardom but at a great personal cost. |
Through the eyes of Colonel Tom Parker, the enigmatic manager, we witness the rise and fall of Elvis Presley, exploring the complexities of their relationship and the price of fame. |
Haunted by the ghost of his twin brother and torn between the sacred and profane, Elvis Presley navigates the challenges of superstardom, cultural appropriation, and personal demons. |
As Elvis Presley struggles to reclaim his artistic identity and escape the clutches of Colonel Tom Parker, he confronts the dark side of fame and the sacrifices he made for success. |
In a Faustian bargain for fame and fortune, Elvis Presley becomes a prisoner of his own image and the manipulations of Colonel Tom Parker, leading to a tragic downfall. |
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Elvis' is a sprawling and ambitious biopic with strong prose, complex characters, and insightful cultural commentary. However, it suffers from pacing issues, underdeveloped aspects of Elvis' emotional journey, and some repetitive scenes. Further development is needed to tighten the narrative, deepen character exploration, and provide a more satisfying resolution.