a few good men
Executive Summary
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USP: This script offers a distinctive take on the military legal drama genre by exploring ethical dilemmas, moral complexities, and the clash between justice and loyalty. Through its realistic character dynamics, witty dialogue, and authentic portrayal of military proceedings, the script provides a fresh and captivating narrative that delves into the complexities of honor, duty, and integrity within the military. The script's unique voice shines in its exploration of these themes, adding depth and richness to the compelling and engaging story it presents.
Overview
Genres: Legal Drama, Thriller, Mystery, Drama, Legal, Military Drama, Military, Comedy, Courtroom Drama, Character Drama, Character Study, Romantic Comedy
Setting: Present day, Guantanamo Bay, Washington D.C., Georgetown.
Overview: The screenplay for A Few Good Men receives an overall score of 8.1, reflecting its strong character development, compelling dialogue, and exploration of complex themes. However, there are opportunities to enhance the plot's unpredictability, deepen the emotional impact, and refine the pacing to further elevate the screenplay's quality.
Themes: Military Justice, Code Red, Honor, Duty
Conflict and Stakes: The conflict between the prosecution and the defense over the guilt or innocence of the Marines charged with murder. The stakes are high for both sides, as the prosecution is seeking a conviction and the defense is fighting for the lives of their clients
Overall Mood: The overall mood of the screenplay is one of tension and suspense.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 14: The scene in which Kaffee and Galloway confront Colonel Jessep about the Code Red is particularly tense and suspenseful, as the audience is unsure of whether or not Jessep will tell the truth.
- Scene 18: The scene in which Kaffee cross-examines Colonel Jessep is another key scene, as it is here that Kaffee finally reveals the truth about what happened to Lance Corporal Santiago.
- Scene 24: The scene in which Dawson and Downey are found not guilty of murder is a moment of relief and triumph, but it is also bittersweet, as the audience is aware of the sacrifices that have been made.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The screenplay is set in the unique and controversial setting of Guantanamo Bay, Cuba.
- Plot Twist : The revelation that Colonel Jessep ordered the Code Red that led to the death of Lance Corporal Santiago is a major plot twist that will keep audiences on the edge of their seats.
- Distinctive Setting : The screenplay is set in a variety of locations, including Guantanamo Bay, Washington D.C., and Georgetown. This gives the film a sense of scope and scale.
- Innovative Idea : The screenplay explores the timely and relevant theme of honor and duty in the military.
- Unique Characters : The screenplay features a cast of well-developed and complex characters.
- Genre Blend : The screenplay blends the genres of legal thriller, drama, and war film.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$30-40 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of drama and legal thrillers
Marketability: The screenplay has a strong central conflict, well-developed characters, and a timely and relevant theme. It has the potential to appeal to a wide audience and generate buzz.
The screenplay has a strong cast of characters, a well-paced plot, and a unique setting. It has the potential to appeal to a wide audience, but it may not be as commercially successful as other legal thrillers.
The screenplay has a strong central conflict and a timely and relevant theme. However, the plot is somewhat predictable and the characters are not as well-developed as they could be. It has the potential to appeal to a niche audience, but it may not be as commercially successful as other legal thrillers.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations.
Scene Level Percentiles
The screenplay excels in dialogue but could benefit from enhancements in character development, emotional impact, and pacing to create a more balanced and engaging narrative.
Screenplay Analysis
Key Strengths
Note: The ratings are the averages of all the scenes.
- Dialogue is ranked very highly (91.87%), indicating that the screenplay's dialogue is likely engaging, natural, and authentic.
- Character development could be strengthened, as indicated by the lower percentile ranking (35.37%).
- Emotional impact could be enhanced to create a more resonant and emotionally engaging experience for the audience (31.3%).
- The pacing of the screenplay might need attention, as it ranks lower in that aspect (37.36%).
The writer may have a focus on creating natural and engaging dialogue, as indicated by the high percentile ranking in that area.
Balancing Elements- To improve the balance of the screenplay, focus on developing more well-rounded characters and enhancing the emotional impact of the story while maintaining the strength in dialogue.
The percentile rankings suggest an integrated writer, with a balance between intuitive elements (high dialogue and character development) and conceptual elements (moderate plot and concept development).
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay shows promise, particularly in the area of dialogue, but would benefit from further development in characterization, emotional impact, and pacing to reach its full potential.
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How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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| 9.50 | 99 | Sense8: 9.25 | Casablanca: 9.50 | |
| Dialogue | 8.4 | 93 | Legally Blonde: 8.3 | a few good men: 8.4 |
| 8.75 | 85 | The Fabelmans: 8.50 | Erin Brokovich: 8.75 | |
| 8.50 | 80 | Inception: 8.25 | a few good men: 8.50 | |
| Internal Goal | 8.17 | 79 | groundhog day: 8.16 | a few good men: 8.17 |
| 8.25 | 75 | Battlefield Earth: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 | |
| 8.25 | 74 | KILLING ZOE: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 | |
| Structure | 8.31 | 73 | El Mariachi: 8.29 | a few good men: 8.31 |
| Story Forward | 8.4 | 72 | Ghostbusters: 8.3 | a few good men: 8.4 |
| High Stakes | 8.2 | 68 | Wild Wild West: 8.1 | Titanic: 8.2 |
| 8.25 | 65 | Gladiator: 8.00 | Titanic: 8.25 | |
| Conflict Level | 8.0 | 63 | KILLING ZOE: 7.9 | a few good men: 8.0 |
| External Goal | 7.40 | 60 | Breaking bad: 7.39 | a few good men: 7.40 |
| Formatting | 8.29 | 59 | Good Will Hunting: 8.26 | a few good men: 8.29 |
| 8.10 | 55 | Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 8.06 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.10 | |
| Originality | 8.71 | 53 | Requiem for a dream: 8.70 | a few good men: 8.71 |
| Plot | 8.0 | 52 | Witness: 7.9 | True Blood: 8.0 |
| Unpredictability | 7.52 | 49 | Titanic: 7.51 | a few good men: 7.52 |
| Character Changes | 6.8 | 49 | Enemy of the State: 6.7 | True Blood: 6.8 |
| 8.25 | 44 | House of cards pilot: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 | |
| Pacing | 8.29 | 43 | What we do in the shadows: 8.27 | a few good men: 8.29 |
| Engagement | 8.94 | 43 | KILLING ZOE: 8.93 | the boys (TV): 8.94 |
| Concept | 8.0 | 42 | Poor Things: 7.9 | a few good men: 8.0 |
| 11350 | 34 | Terminator 2: 11349 | a few good men: 11350 | |
| Characters | 8.1 | 34 | Memento: 8.0 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.1 |
| Overall | 8.2 | 33 | Witness: 8.1 | a few good men: 8.2 |
| Emotional Impact | 7.2 | 26 | House of cards pilot: 7.1 | the 5th element: 7.2 |
| 7.25 | 3 | Enemy of the State: 6.75 | a few good men: 7.25 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp, witty dialogue, realistic character interactions, and a focus on moral dilemmas. The dialogue is fast-paced, engaging, and filled with tension, reflecting the complex dynamics between characters.
Best representation: Scene 1 - Jo's Request. This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's sharp dialogue, realistic character interactions, and focus on moral dilemmas. The fast-paced and engaging dialogue sets the tone for the screenplay, highlighting the tension and complexity of the relationships between the characters.
Memorable Lines:
- Jessep: You can't handle the truth! (Scene 44)
- Jessep: You're goddamn right I did. (Scene 45)
- Kaffee: You're dismissed. (Scene 5)
- Jessep: You gotta ask me nicely. (Scene 17)
- Kaffee: Fuck you, Harold. (Scene 18)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a predominant style characterized by sharp and engaging dialogue, complex character dynamics, and morally ambiguous scenarios. The writing effectively conveys tension and conflict through intense confrontations and thought-provoking dilemmas, leaving a lasting impact on the audience.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- David Mamet
Story Shape
Engine: Claude
Screenplay Rating:
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'A Few Good Men' is a well-crafted and compelling legal drama that delves into the complex world of military culture and the challenges of upholding justice. The narrative structure is strong, with a clear story arc, well-developed characters, and a compelling central conflict. The courtroom scenes are particularly well-written, with dynamic dialogue and effective character development. The screenplay explores themes of duty, honor, and the complexities of military culture in a thought-provoking and nuanced manner. While there are some areas that could be improved, such as the pacing of the early scenes and the exploration of the characters' emotional journeys, the overall strength of the screenplay makes it a strong candidate for consideration.
Strengths
- The screenplay has a strong narrative structure, with a clear story arc, well-developed characters, and a compelling central conflict. high
- The courtroom scenes are particularly well-written, with dynamic dialogue and effective character development. high ( Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 )
- The screenplay explores themes of duty, honor, and the complexities of military culture in a thought-provoking and nuanced manner. high
- The opening scenes effectively establish the story's setting, characters, and central conflict. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 )
- The climactic courtroom scenes are well-paced and build to a powerful conclusion. high ( Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 41 Scene 42 Scene 43 Scene 44 )
Areas of Improvement
- Some of the early expository dialogue could be streamlined or delivered in a more organic way. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 10 )
- The transition between the Washington Navy Yard and Guantanamo Bay could be smoother and more visually engaging. medium ( Scene 14 Scene 15 )
- The screenplay could benefit from a deeper exploration of the emotional journeys and inner conflicts of the key characters, particularly Dawson and Downey. medium
MissingElements
- The screenplay could be enhanced by the inclusion of more visual descriptions and cinematic moments to fully immerse the reader in the story's world. medium
NotablePoints
- The final act of the screenplay, leading up to and including the climactic courtroom scenes, is exceptionally well-crafted and builds to a powerful and satisfying conclusion. high ( Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 Scene 43 Scene 44 )
- The screenplay's exploration of the complexities of military culture and the often competing priorities of duty, honor, and justice is a notable strength. high
- The screenplay features a strong ensemble cast of well-developed characters, each with their own motivations and perspectives. high
Engine: GPT4
Screenplay Rating:
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay 'A Few Good Men' offers a compelling courtroom drama centered around themes of honor, duty, and the moral complexities of obedience. The narrative is well-structured with strong character arcs, particularly for Lt. Kaffee, who experiences significant personal growth. The climax is particularly strong, providing a satisfying resolution to the intense build-up.
Strengths
- The screenplay effectively builds tension and develops its characters, particularly in the courtroom scenes where the dialogue and interactions drive the narrative forward. high
- The climax of the film in the courtroom is exceptionally well-written, providing a satisfying and dramatic resolution to the build-up of legal and moral conflict. high ( Scene 46 )
- The cross-examination scenes are a showcase of sharp dialogue and strategic character positioning, highlighting Kaffee's growth as a lawyer. high ( Scene 34 Scene 35 )
- The screenplay uses a strong narrative structure that keeps the audience engaged through clear conflict and compelling stakes. medium
- The opening scenes set up the story's context and stakes effectively, providing a solid foundation for the unfolding drama. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 2 )
Areas of Improvement
- Some scenes could be tightened to enhance pacing, particularly in the first act where the setup might feel slow to some audiences. medium
- The screenplay could further explore the backgrounds and motivations of secondary characters to enhance the story's depth. low
MissingElements
- The screenplay could benefit from more visual descriptions that enhance the cinematic quality of the scenes. medium
NotablePoints
- The dialogue is sharp and memorable, contributing significantly to character development and the screenplay's overall impact. high
Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 7.25, The screenplay showcases strengths in character development by presenting well-rounded characters with distinct motivations, flaws, and growth trajectories. The main character, Kaffee, undergoes a compelling transformation throughout the story, evolving from a detached lawyer to a passionate advocate for justice. However, the other characters' arcs could be further developed to enhance the emotional impact and relatability of the story. See More
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay for A Few Good Men presents a clear and compelling premise that effectively sets up a captivating legal drama centered around the complexities of military justice, the code of honor, and the pursuit of truth. The initial hook, involving the death of a marine and the subsequent investigation, immediately grabs the audience's attention. However, further exploration of the ethical dilemmas faced by the characters and the potential consequences of their actions could enhance the long-term intrigue and audience engagement. See More
Structure: 8.25, This legal drama possesses a well-structured plot and compelling narrative, effectively portraying the intricacies of the military justice system and moral dilemmas faced by its characters. While the screenplay adheres to traditional narrative structures, it also incorporates unexpected twists and turns that keep the audience engaged. The exploration of complex themes and character arcs enriches the story, but some areas could benefit from further refinement to enhance the emotional impact and pacing. See More
Theme: 9.5, The screenplay effectively explores and conveys significant themes through its compelling and nuanced narrative. The themes and messages are woven into the plot and character arcs with clarity and purpose, leading to a deep emotional and intellectual engagement with the audience. See More
Visual Impact: 8.5, This screenplay effectively utilizes vivid imagery to bring its story to life, immersing the reader in its compelling narrative. The visual descriptions provide a solid foundation for visual storytelling, capturing the intensity and emotional depth of the characters and events. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.25, The screenplay, though emotionally charged with a compelling narrative, misses key opportunities to fully harness its potential for profound emotional depth. While it succeeds in capturing raw emotions, character complexities, and key moments of emotional intensity, it falters slightly in delivering a highly nuanced and multifaceted emotional experience for the audience. See More
Conflict: 8.25, The screenplay's conflict and stakes provide a solid foundation for tension and audience engagement. The conflict between the defense and prosecution teams is well-defined and compelling, with the stakes significantly driving the narrative. However, there are opportunities to deepen the conflict and raise the stakes even further, leading to an even more engaging and suspenseful experience. See More
Originality: 8.25, This screenplay exhibits a strong foundation in originality and creative approaches, particularly through its exploration of complex moral dilemmas, the juxtaposition of idealism and pragmatism, and its unconventional character arcs. The narrative structure and storytelling techniques are largely conventional, but the screenplay's focus on character development and morally ambiguous situations elevates it beyond formulaic legal dramas. See More
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay for A Few Good Men presents a clear and compelling premise that effectively sets up a captivating legal drama centered around the complexities of military justice, the code of honor, and the pursuit of truth. The initial hook, involving the death of a marine and the subsequent investigation, immediately grabs the audience's attention. However, further exploration of the ethical dilemmas faced by the characters and the potential consequences of their actions could enhance the long-term intrigue and audience engagement. See More
Structure: 8.25, This legal drama possesses a well-structured plot and compelling narrative, effectively portraying the intricacies of the military justice system and moral dilemmas faced by its characters. While the screenplay adheres to traditional narrative structures, it also incorporates unexpected twists and turns that keep the audience engaged. The exploration of complex themes and character arcs enriches the story, but some areas could benefit from further refinement to enhance the emotional impact and pacing. See More
Theme: 9.5, The screenplay effectively explores and conveys significant themes through its compelling and nuanced narrative. The themes and messages are woven into the plot and character arcs with clarity and purpose, leading to a deep emotional and intellectual engagement with the audience. See More
Visual Impact: 8.5, This screenplay effectively utilizes vivid imagery to bring its story to life, immersing the reader in its compelling narrative. The visual descriptions provide a solid foundation for visual storytelling, capturing the intensity and emotional depth of the characters and events. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.25, The screenplay, though emotionally charged with a compelling narrative, misses key opportunities to fully harness its potential for profound emotional depth. While it succeeds in capturing raw emotions, character complexities, and key moments of emotional intensity, it falters slightly in delivering a highly nuanced and multifaceted emotional experience for the audience. See More
Conflict: 8.25, The screenplay's conflict and stakes provide a solid foundation for tension and audience engagement. The conflict between the defense and prosecution teams is well-defined and compelling, with the stakes significantly driving the narrative. However, there are opportunities to deepen the conflict and raise the stakes even further, leading to an even more engaging and suspenseful experience. See More
Originality: 8.25, This screenplay exhibits a strong foundation in originality and creative approaches, particularly through its exploration of complex moral dilemmas, the juxtaposition of idealism and pragmatism, and its unconventional character arcs. The narrative structure and storytelling techniques are largely conventional, but the screenplay's focus on character development and morally ambiguous situations elevates it beyond formulaic legal dramas. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- The scene begins with a Marine on duty in a Guantanamo Bay watchtower. Marines Dawson and Downey enter a barracks and subdue Santiago. Meanwhile, the US Marine Corps Band performs at the Washington Navy Yard and Navy lawyer Joanne Galloway enters the Judge Advocate General's Corps building.
- Lt. Commander Galloway requests to represent accused marines in a code red case, but her request is denied due to lack of trial experience.
- During a softball game, Kaffee and Spradling debate the McDermott case. Kaffee argues for a lenient plea deal, while Spradling insists on harsh charges. Despite their disagreement, they negotiate a compromise and Kaffee agrees to play third base in the game.
- In a conference room, Captain Whitaker briefs Navy and Marine lawyers on the case of Marine Corporal Dawson and PFC Louden Downey, accused of killing PFC William Santiago by tying him up and stuffing a toxin-treated rag down his throat. Lieutenant Kaffee is reluctantly assigned as lead counsel, with Lieutenant Junior Grade Sam Weinberg as co-counsel. Weinberg protests his lack of responsibilities, and Kaffee questions the timing of the flight to Cuba, ending the scene.
- Lieutenant Kaffee and Lieutenant Weinberg receive the case files for the murder of Private First Class Santiago from Commander Galloway, despite Kaffee's lack of experience. They quickly realize that letters written by Santiago before his death could potentially be damaging to the prosecution's case.
- Over the past eight months, Santiago, a PFC marine, has endured harsh treatment in Guantanamo Bay. He has been pressured to keep up with a running group, forced to do push-ups in the rain, isolated in the mess hall, and verbally abused by a Lieutenant. The stress culminated in him being pushed down a rocky hill, resulting in heat exhaustion. In response, Santiago has written a letter to his commanding officer, outlining his struggles and requesting assistance.
- Colonel Jessep receives a letter from PFC Santiago regarding an illegal shooting incident. Despite Captain Markinson's suggestion to transfer Santiago, Jessep asserts his authority and decides to keep him for training, emphasizing the priority of saving lives. The scene ends with Jessep leaving the office, leaving Markinson alone.
- A procession of military vehicles arrives at the Washington Navy Yard. Dawson and Downey, two young soldiers, are escorted out of an unmarked sedan. Dawson, a corporal, remains silent, while Downey, a farm boy from Iowa, looks to him for guidance. The scene ends as the M.P. orders them to move.
- Lieutenant Kaffee, a softball coach and lawyer assigned to defend Dawson and Downey, is confronted by Commander Jo about his handling of the case. Jo believes that Kaffee is not taking the case seriously and threatens to report him to his supervisor. Kaffee is initially dismissive but becomes more serious after Jo's speech. Jo reveals that she believes Santiago's death was not intentional. Kaffee remains confident in his ability to handle the case, but Jo warns him about a "code red," which Kaffee does not understand.
- Marine lawyers Kaffee and Weinberg interrogate Lance Corporal Dawson and PFC Downey about the assault on Santiago. Dawson claims he ordered the assault to train Santiago, not to kill him. Kaffee warns Dawson that he is the only friend he has.
- In a tense meeting, lawyers Kaffee and Ross debate a plea deal for two marines accused of murder. Kaffee argues for a 12-year sentence, citing inconclusive poison test results and orders from their commander not to harm the victim. Ross insists on a 20-year sentence, supported by medical testimony. They agree to reconvene after Kaffee investigates further and schedule a friendly softball game.
- As Kaffee walks to his car, Jo intercepts him to make peace and call off her investigation. However, Kaffee's suspicion arises when he learns Jo spoke to his client's aunt. He invites her to Cuba before abruptly leaving. Despite the initial conflict, Jo remains determined to be involved.
- Sam shares the excitement of his daughter's first word with Kaffee, who initially doubts but later accepts it. They discuss the plea deal Kaffee received and decide to take it. As they talk about preventing motion sickness for their flight to Cuba, Kaffee reveals information from Ross about Kendrick's instructions to the platoon regarding Santiago.
- Lieutenants Kaffee, Weinberg, and Commander Galloway arrive at Guantanamo Bay and are met by Corporal Howard. They are informed of the need to wear camouflage jackets due to the proximity to the Cuban fenceline. Kaffee sarcastically remarks to Sam about the need for the jackets.
- Lt. Kaffee, Sam Weinberg, and Joanne Galloway interview Santiago's squad about the time of their meeting the day Santiago was killed. Kendrick confirms that he met with his men at 4pm.
- The lawyers inspect Santiago's room, finding nothing of interest. Kaffee suggests returning the uniforms to Santiago's parents, but Kendrick claims they belong to the Marine Corps. Kendrick believes Santiago's death was due to his lack of code and honor, while Kaffee plans to investigate later.
- **Colonel Jessep's Interrogation** Lawyers grill Jessep about Santiago's transfer and the alleged 'Code Red.' Despite initial resistance, Jessep provides the transfer order, demanding politeness. The exchange highlights the conflict between legal procedure and military authority.
- Kaffee learns that Downey has hired Jo as his attorney. Jo reveals evidence that Kendrick ordered the Code Red on Santiago, contradicting his previous testimony. Kaffee and Jo confront Dawson and Downey, who confirm Kendrick's order but claim it occurred after dismissing the platoon.
- Commander Kaffee and Jo Galloway confront Ross about an order given to Kendrick leading to Santiago's abuse. Ross denies knowledge, leading to accusations of code of ethics violations and lying. Kaffee reveals defendants will plead not guilty and testify about the order, implicating higher-ups. Ross offers a plea deal, but Jo rejects, confident in their case. Ross threatens more severe charges if they go to trial, pressuring Danny to accept the plea.
- Frustrated lieutenant Kaffee offers a plea deal to Marines Dawson and Downey, but they adamantly refuse, vowing to uphold their integrity despite facing a lengthier prison sentence. Kaffee, enraged by their decision, storms out of the room, leaving Dawson and Downey unwavering in their determination to maintain their honor.
- Kaffee grapples with the decision of taking on Dawson's case after Jo challenges his beliefs. Despite his initial resistance, Jo's words leave him shaken, forcing him to weigh his motivations and the consequences of walking away.
- During the arraignment, Lance Corporal Dawson and Private Downey plead not guilty to charges of conspiracy to commit murder, murder in the first degree, and conduct unbecoming a Marine. The defense attorney, Lieutenant Kaffee, and his team plan their next steps in preparing for the trial, including gathering medical and fitness records on the defendants.
- Amidst piles of paperwork, Sam questions Kaffee's need for his assistance on the case. Kaffee reassures him of his importance, explaining the distinction between obeying orders and unlawful commands. Jo arrives with medical reports and takeout as the team delves into preparation for the upcoming trial.
- Kaffee, Jo, and Sam prepare for trial by spreading out books and papers in a coffee shop. Kaffee continues to question Sam about the lack of external damage on the victim, who Sam tells him to stop asking about. Kaffee also tells Dawson and Downey that they need to start referring to the victim by his name instead of a nickname.
- Kaffee gives Sam and Jo instructions for their courtroom conduct, including maintaining composure and refraining from wearing perfume. Jo attempts to apologize for past conflicts, but Kaffee dismisses it, acknowledging her newfound respect for him. As they depart, Kaffee expresses his belief that they will lose the case.
- As the highly anticipated trial of Dawson and Downey commences, tensions soar in the courtroom. Defense attorney Kaffee engages with the defendants' families, expressing confidence in his clients' innocence. In his opening statement, prosecutor Ross asserts their malicious intent in killing Santiago, while Kaffee counters that they acted under orders. The prosecution's key witness, Special Agent McGuire, testifies as the trial unfolds.
- During a military trial, Lieutenant Ross questions Special Agent McGuire about the investigation into the illegal firing of a weapon over the fenceline. McGuire confirms the existence of a letter alleging the incident and reports notifying Colonel Jessep of his intent to investigate. Dawson, a sentry, is identified as the only individual with a missing round of ammunition, leading to suspicions of his involvement. However, insufficient evidence prevents a charge for firing at the enemy without cause. Ross argues that Santiago's death has hindered verification of his claims, implicating Dawson further. McGuire acknowledges the lack of evidence, and they agree to a stipulation that no other members of the unit were present during the incident.
- Commander Stone testifies that Willy Santiago died from poisoning, caused by lactic acidosis from an ingested poison. Ross objects to Stone's testimony but is overruled. Stone maintains that Santiago had no coronary condition. After Stone's testimony, the government rests its case.
- In his apartment, Kaffee misinterprets Jo's dinner invitation as a date, causing an awkward exchange. Despite her denial, he agrees to join her for dinner, leaving the situation unresolved.
- After dinner, Kaffee and Jo discuss the case and her previous work. They are interrupted by the testimony of Corporal Howard, who reveals that code reds were not an official punishment and that Dawson prevented them from being given to Santiago. Ross tries to discredit Howard, but Kaffee shows that the Marine Corps Guidebook is incomplete. The scene ends with Howard stepping down from the stand, leaving Kaffee and Jo to contemplate the implications.
- Kaffee, startled to find Markinson in his car, learns that Markinson has crucial information about Kendrick's case. Despite initial reluctance, Markinson agrees to assist Kaffee in exchange for a deal, setting up a tense and suspenseful dynamic.
- Kaffee informs Jo and Sam about a crucial witness and plans to obtain the Tower Chief's Log from GITMO. Jo ensures witness protection while Kaffee and Sam discuss Jessep's story discrepancies, showing their determination to build a strong case.
- Kaffee and Ross engage in a tense discussion about their strategy in the Markinson and Jessep case. Ross cautions Kaffee about the risks of accusing high-ranking military officers without substantial evidence, but Kaffee remains determined to pursue the case despite the potential consequences.
- In court, Kaffee cross-examines Kendrick, revealing the negative fitness report he gave Dawson after Dawson disobeyed Kendrick's order to punish Barnes. Kaffee suggests this was retaliation. Kendrick denies this but appears defensive. Despite Ross's objection, the judge allows Kaffee's questioning. Kaffee ends by asking about Kendrick ordering a code red for Santiago, but Kendrick doesn't answer.
- Kaffee confronts Markinson about the discrepancies in the tower chief's log, leading to the revelation that Jessep orchestrated the disappearance of an entire flight to cover up his actions.
- As Jo and Kaffee prepare for cross-examination, Markinson grapples with turmoil. Writing a letter and donning his uniform, he succumbs to despair and commits suicide, leaving behind a profound sense of loss and sorrow.
- During cross-examination, Downey's testimony about a 'code red' order is questioned by Ross. When presented with evidence of a timeline discrepancy, Downey admits to following an order from Corporal Dawson to assault Santiago.
- In Kaffee's apartment, Jo, Sam, and a drunk Kaffee discuss the case. Jo insists on calling witnesses, discussing Markinson's death, and putting Jessep on the stand. Kaffee's doubts escalate into a breakdown, expressing skepticism about winning the case. Sam attempts to reassure him, highlighting Kaffee's motivation and the importance of the case. The scene concludes with Sam and Kaffee sharing a personal conversation.
- Jo initially ignores Kaffee's apology but is intrigued when he mentions putting Jessep on the stand. Kaffee becomes animated and confident, declaring that he has a plan to make Jessep confess. Jo, Kaffee, and Sam brainstorm ideas for their case against Jessep. Kaffee realizes that Jo has put his baseball bat in the closet, which he needs for inspiration. He abruptly leaves to retrieve it from his office.
- Lieutenant Kaffee reviews a military coded phone bill and discusses his strategy with Jo in the courthouse corridor. Jo is concerned about Kaffee's approach, but Kaffee believes the witness will have a lot to answer for. They both head back to the courtroom, preparing for the next session of the trial.
- In a courtroom, Sam enters with two new airmen. Randolph orders Kaffee to call his witness, with Kaffee asking about Sam's whereabouts and Jo assuring him he'll be there. Colonel Nathan Jessep enters, and the defense asks him about a meeting he had with two other officers regarding a letter from Santiago. Captain Markinson is revealed to have died by suicide, and Kaffee questions Jessep about orders he gave to Kendrick and Markinson. Jessep states he ordered Santiago to be transferred off base due to potential danger, and that he flew to Washington that morning in fatigues, bringing a change of clothes and personal items.
- During cross-examination, Lt. Kaffee confronts Colonel Jessep about inconsistencies in his account of Marine Santiago's transfer. Kaffee presents evidence suggesting Santiago had no intention of leaving the base, including the lack of packing and communication with loved ones. Jessep remains evasive, claiming ignorance about Santiago's plans.
- In court, Kaffee confronts Jessep about conflicting orders given regarding Santiago's safety. Jessep's flustered reaction leads to inconsistencies in his testimony, highlighting the conflict between his words and the evidence.
- In the courtroom, Kaffee relentlessly interrogates Colonel Jessep about the Code Red that killed Santiago. Despite objections, Kaffee accuses Jessep of ordering the transfer to cover up the truth. Jessep admits responsibility, shocking the courtroom. The jury is dismissed and an Article 39a session is initiated to advise Jessep of his rights.
- In a heated courtroom confrontation, Col. Jessep lunges at Lt. Kaffee in rage but is restrained by military police. Jessep insists he saved lives by his actions, while Kaffee accuses him of weakening the country. Kaffee arrests Jessep, who is led out of the courtroom by MPs.
- **Dawson and Downey:** Found guilty of conduct unbecoming a Marine and dishonorably discharged. **Kaffee:** Tries to comfort Dawson, reminding him that honor is not defined by a patch on one's arm. **Ross:** Informs Kaffee that the witnesses he lined up have no recollection of anything.
- After a successful trial, Kaffee, Jo, and Sam are celebrating outside the courthouse. Jo suggests they take the rest of the day off and go out, but Sam declines, wanting to go home and talk to his daughter. Jo asks Kaffee what his plans are next, and he tells her he's going to work on the case of Staff Sergeant Henry Williamson. Jo suggests they celebrate, but Kaffee asks her out on a real date instead. Jo agrees, and they arrange to meet at 7 pm. Before they part ways, Jo tells Kaffee to wear matching socks.
CharacterInconsistencies
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Character Daniel Kaffee
Description Kaffee is initially portrayed as apathetic and uninterested in his cases, prioritizing plea bargains and softball. However, he later displays a strong sense of justice and fights passionately for his clients, which seems like a sudden shift in his character.
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Character Dr. Stone
Description Dr. Stone's certainty about Santiago's poisoning despite inconclusive evidence and his possible negligence in overlooking Santiago's heart condition raise questions about his motives and professionalism.
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StoryInconsistencies
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Description The sudden change in Dr. Stone's diagnosis of Santiago's cause of death after meeting with Jessep is a significant inconsistency that casts doubt on the official narrative and suggests a potential cover-up.
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Description Markinson's claim about an 11 p.m. flight contradicts the official records, and the subsequent revelation that Jessep could manipulate flight records creates a major inconsistency and raises questions about the extent of Jessep's influence and control.
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PlotHoles
DialogueAuthenticity
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Description Jessep's use of casual and sometimes crude language in a formal setting, while potentially reflecting his personality, might be considered unrealistic for a high-ranking officer in front of visiting legal counsel.
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Description Jessep's impassioned speech about the realities of war and the necessity of his actions, while powerful and dramatic, could be seen as overly theatrical and unrealistic for a military officer in a courtroom setting.
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Redundancies
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Element Kaffee's apathetic attitude and jokes
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Suggestion The repeated emphasis on Kaffee's lack of interest in his cases and his reliance on humor could be streamlined to avoid slowing down the initial pacing and allow for a more gradual development of his character arc. -
Element Jo's insistence on Kaffee's potential and the importance of the case
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Suggestion While Jo's persistence is crucial to the plot, some instances of her urging Kaffee to take the case seriously could be condensed to maintain a balance between her determination and Kaffee's gradual transformation.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
| Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
|---|---|---|---|
| Joanne Galloway | Joanne Galloway starts off as a determined and passionate military lawyer who fights for justice and challenges authority. As the story progresses, she becomes more serious and dedicated, pushing Kaffee to take the case seriously. By the end, she is straightforward and direct in her interactions, showing a strong sense of duty and responsibility. | The character arc for Joanne Galloway is well-developed, showing her growth and evolution throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more depth added to her character by exploring her personal motivations and backstory further. | To improve the character arc for Joanne Galloway, consider incorporating flashbacks or dialogue that reveal more about her past experiences and how they have shaped her beliefs and values. This will add complexity to her character and make her more relatable to the audience. |
| Kaffee | At the beginning of the screenplay, Lieutenant Daniel Kaffee is portrayed as a talented but indifferent lawyer who is focused on securing plea deals. However, as he delves deeper into the case and uncovers new information, he becomes more engaged and determined to seek justice for his clients. Throughout the trial, Kaffee confronts his own beliefs and values, ultimately making a bold decision to plead not guilty and challenge the status quo. By the end of the screenplay, Kaffee has evolved into a confident and principled defense attorney, driven by a sense of justice and a desire to uncover the truth. | The character arc for Lieutenant Daniel Kaffee is well-developed and shows a clear progression from indifference to determination. However, there could be more emphasis on Kaffee's internal struggles and personal growth throughout the screenplay. Additionally, his evolution from a sarcastic and dismissive lawyer to a confident and principled defender could be further explored to add depth to his character. | To improve the character arc for Lieutenant Daniel Kaffee, consider incorporating more scenes that highlight his internal conflicts and emotional journey. Show moments of vulnerability and introspection to deepen his character development. Additionally, explore the impact of his personal connections and relationships on his growth as a defense attorney. By delving deeper into Kaffee's inner struggles and moral dilemmas, the character arc can be enhanced to create a more compelling and nuanced portrayal of his transformation. |
| Sam | Sam starts off as a diligent and supportive member of the defense team, excelling at research and witness preparation. As the trial progresses, he becomes more observant and questioning of the moral implications of their actions, serving as a voice of reason and grounding presence amidst the chaos. By the end of the screenplay, Sam has evolved into a calm and rational colleague who offers reassurance and practical advice to Kaffee, providing a counterbalance to his intensity. | The character arc for Sam is well-developed, showing growth and evolution throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more emphasis on his personal journey and internal conflicts to add depth to his character. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other team members and how they influence his decisions could enhance his arc. | To improve the character arc for Sam, consider delving deeper into his backstory and motivations to understand why he is so dedicated to the case. Show more interactions between Sam and other team members to highlight his growth and development. Additionally, explore how Sam's personal beliefs and values shape his decisions and actions throughout the screenplay. |
| Dawson | Corporal Dawson starts as a hero figure, following orders and grappling with moral dilemmas. As the story progresses, he faces challenges that test his loyalty and integrity, ultimately leading to a pivotal moment where he must choose between following orders and standing up for what he believes is right. This decision shapes his character and leads to a transformation where he finds a balance between duty and morality, ultimately becoming a symbol of honor and integrity within the Marine Corps. | The character arc for Corporal Dawson is well-developed and engaging, showcasing his internal struggles and growth throughout the story. However, to enhance the arc, there could be more emphasis on the emotional toll of his decisions and the consequences of his actions. This would add depth to his character and make his transformation more impactful for the audience. | To improve the character arc for Corporal Dawson, consider adding more scenes that delve into his internal conflict and the emotional weight of his choices. Show how his loyalty to his code of honor is tested and how he grapples with the consequences of his actions. This will make his transformation more compelling and resonate with the audience on a deeper level. |
| Ross | Lt. Jack Ross starts off as a seasoned marine lawyer focused on achieving the best outcome for his clients. As the trial progresses, he becomes more confrontational and aggressive in his tactics, determined to secure a conviction against the defendants. However, he is also torn between his duty to the government and his personal beliefs, leading to internal conflict and challenging decisions. Ultimately, Ross must confront his own moral compass and decide where his loyalties truly lie. | The character arc for Lt. Jack Ross is well-developed, showcasing his evolution from a seasoned lawyer to a conflicted individual torn between duty and personal beliefs. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggle and moral dilemma, allowing for a more nuanced portrayal of his character. Additionally, exploring the reasons behind Ross's aggressive tactics and confrontational behavior could provide further insight into his motivations and add complexity to his arc. | To improve the character arc for Lt. Jack Ross, consider delving deeper into his backstory and motivations for his actions. Showcasing moments of vulnerability and internal conflict can add depth to his character and make his evolution more compelling. Additionally, providing more context for his aggressive tactics and confrontational behavior can help the audience understand his mindset and the driving forces behind his actions. |
| Jo | Jo starts as a determined and serious lawyer who takes her job seriously, but as the case progresses, she becomes more passionate and empathetic towards the defendants. Her strong sense of justice leads her to challenge authority and confront difficult truths, ultimately leading to a pivotal moment where she must make a difficult decision that tests her principles and convictions. Through this journey, Jo learns the importance of empathy and compassion in the pursuit of justice, ultimately solidifying her commitment to fighting for what is right. | The character arc for Jo is well-developed, showcasing her growth from a determined lawyer to a compassionate advocate for justice. However, there could be more emphasis on the internal struggles she faces as she confronts difficult truths and challenges authority. This would add depth to her character and make her arc even more compelling. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more internal conflict for Jo as she grapples with the ethical dilemmas and moral complexities of the case. Show her struggling with her own beliefs and motivations, highlighting the emotional toll of seeking justice in a challenging legal environment. This will add layers to her character and make her transformation more impactful. |
| Jessep | Throughout the screenplay, Colonel Jessep's character arc evolves from a confident and unapologetic figure to a vulnerable and conflicted individual. Initially, he is portrayed as a strong and authoritative leader who believes in the necessity of his actions to maintain order. However, as the truth is revealed and his facade begins to crumble, Jessep is forced to confront his own moral compass and the consequences of his decisions. This internal conflict ultimately leads to a moment of vulnerability and self-reflection, where Jessep must come to terms with the repercussions of his actions and the impact they have had on those around him. | The character arc for Colonel Jessep is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for the audience to follow. However, to enhance the emotional depth of the character, it would be beneficial to explore more moments of vulnerability and introspection throughout the screenplay. By delving deeper into Jessep's internal struggles and moral dilemmas, the audience can better understand the complexity of his character and the reasons behind his actions. | To improve the character arc for Colonel Jessep, consider adding scenes that showcase his internal conflict and emotional turmoil. This could involve moments of introspection where Jessep grapples with the consequences of his decisions and the impact they have had on his men. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth could provide further insight into his motivations and beliefs. By adding layers to Jessep's character, the audience can better empathize with his journey and the challenges he faces. |
| Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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| Military Justice | The film follows the trial of two Marines accused of murdering a fellow Marine. The trial exposes the flaws in the military justice system, including the pressure on lawyers to obtain plea deals and the difficulty of getting witnesses to testify against their superiors. | Military justice is a unique system of law that governs the conduct of members of the military. It is designed to maintain discipline and order within the military and to ensure that members of the military are treated fairly and justly. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Military Justice:
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| Code Red | A code red is an unauthorized punishment that is carried out by enlisted men. In the film, the defendants are accused of killing a fellow Marine as part of a code red. The prosecution argues that the code red was ordered by the defendants' superiors, while the defense argues that the code red was not authorized and that the defendants were acting in self-defense. | Code red is a term used to describe a situation in which a group of people, typically soldiers, take matters into their own hands and punish someone outside of the normal legal system. | ||||||||||||
| Honor | The film explores the theme of honor, both in the military and in life in general. The defendants are accused of killing a fellow Marine, and the prosecution argues that they did so to protect their own honor. The defense, however, argues that the defendants were acting in self-defense and that they were not motivated by a desire to protect their honor. | Honor is a complex concept that can be defined in many different ways. In general, honor refers to a person's sense of self-worth and self-respect. | ||||||||||||
| Duty | The film also explores the theme of duty. The defendants are Marines, and they are sworn to uphold the law and to protect their country. The prosecution argues that the defendants violated their duty by killing a fellow Marine. The defense, however, argues that the defendants were acting in self-defense and that they were not motivated by a desire to protect their country. | Duty refers to the obligations that a person has to others. These obligations can be moral, legal, or social. | ||||||||||||
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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| internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to uncover the truth behind the events leading to Santiago's death and challenge the corrupt practices within the military. |
| External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to defend their clients and prove their innocence. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the tension between seeking justice and upholding military protocol. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's goals and conflicts lead to their growth and transformation as they navigate the complexities of the legal system and military culture, challenging their beliefs and values.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals drive the narrative forward, creating tension and conflict that propel the story towards a resolution. The philosophical conflicts add depth to the character's journey and provide a philosophical backdrop to the legal drama unfolding.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts in the screenplay explore themes of justice, integrity, loyalty, and the complexities of moral decision-making. The protagonist's struggle to uncover the truth and seek justice highlights the ethical dilemmas inherent in the legal system and the military hierarchy.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \
It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.
| Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | ||||
| 1 - Arrival at Guantanamo Bay | Suspenseful, Intense, Professional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 2 - Jo's Request | Serious, Tense, Professional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 3 - Softball Interrupted: Kaffee and Spradling Clash Over McDermott Case | Sarcastic, Light-hearted, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 4 - Case Assignment | Serious, Studious, Sarcastic, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 4 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 5 - A Case in Guantanamo | Serious, Intense, Professional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 6 - Santiago's Struggles in Guantanamo Bay | Serious, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 7 - PFC Santiago's Fate | Serious, Authoritative, Intense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 8 - Arrival at the Brig | Intense, Professional, Inquisitive | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 9 - Confrontation on the Softball Field | null | 0 | 0 | 0 | 9 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 7 | 0 | 7 | 0 | 0 | 7 | 0 | 0 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 10 - The Guantanamo Interrogation | Serious, Intense, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8.5 | 8 | |
| 11 - Plea Deal Negotiations | Serious, Tense, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 12 - Reconciliation and Suspicion | Sarcastic, Confrontational, Light-hearted | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 13 - Fatherhood and Plea Deals | Serious, Reflective, Contentious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 14 - Arrival at Guantanamo Bay | Serious, Tense, Authoritative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 15 - Squad Interview | Serious, Tense, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 16 - Santiago's Room | Serious, Tense, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 17 - Confrontation at the Officers Club | Tense, Confrontational, Serious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | |
| 18 - Confronting the Truth | Intense, Serious, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 19 - Confrontation at the Gym | Intense, Confrontational, Suspenseful | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 20 - Refusal of Plea Deal | Intense, Confrontational, Defiant | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 21 - The Weight of Justice | Somber, Reflective, Defiant | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 22 - Arraignment of Dawson and Downey | Serious, Intense, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 23 - Preparing for the Defense | Serious, Tense, Investigative, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 24 - Trial Preparation | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 25 - Late Night Preparation | Serious, Tense, Reflective | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 26 - Trial of Dawson and Downey Commences | Serious, Tense, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 27 - Military Trial: Investigation into Illegal Weapon Discharge | Serious, Intense, Investigative | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 28 - Santiago Poisoning Testimony | Intense, Serious, Confrontational, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 29 - Awkward Encounter | Tense, Serious, Sarcastic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 4 | 8 | 6 | 3 | 7 | 2 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 30 - The Code Red Revelation | Serious, Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 31 - Markinson's Revelation | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 32 - Planning the Next Steps | Intense, Suspenseful, Determined, Inquisitive | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 33 - A Strategic Discussion | Intense, Confrontational, Serious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 34 - Cross-Examination of Lt. Kendrick | Intense, Confrontational, Dramatic | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 35 - Confrontation at the Motel | Intense, Suspenseful, Serious | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 36 - Amidst Trial Preparations, a Tragedy Unfolds | Intense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 37 - Downey's Confession | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8.5 | |
| 38 - Kaffee's Crisis | Serious, Reflective, Intense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 39 - A Plan to Confront Jessep | "Defeated" | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 0 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 40 - Preparing for the Next Session | Tense, Serious, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 41 - Colonel Jessep's Testimony | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 42 - Santiago's Mysterious Plans | Intense, Confrontational, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 43 - Kaffee's Confrontation | Intense, Confrontational, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 44 - The Confrontation | Intense, Confrontational, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 45 - Confrontation in the Courtroom | Intense, Confrontational, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 46 - Bittersweet Verdict | Intense, Dramatic, Confrontational, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 47 - A Date to Celebrate | Serious, Reflective, Light-hearted | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 5 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Compelling conflict
- Sharp dialogue
- Engaging dialogue
- Establishing the legal setting and stakes
- Effective portrayal of characters' emotions
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development in this scene
- Lack of significant emotional impact
- Limited emotional depth
- Some repetitive dialogue
- Limited physical action
Suggestions
- Make sure each scene is advancing the plot and developing characters in a meaningful way
- Focus on creating more impactful and emotional moments throughout the script
- Try to vary the dialogue and avoid repetitive elements
- Consider adding more physical action to create visual interest
- Spend time developing secondary characters to add depth to the overall story
World Building
- Physical environment: The screenplay is set in various locations, including a military base in Guantanamo Bay, Cuba; a military courtroom; and a suburban street. The physical environment is often used to create a sense of tension and suspense. For example, the military base is a harsh and unforgiving environment, and the courtroom is a place where high-stakes decisions are made. The conflicts that take place within the story are directly tied to the physical nature of the world, especially in terms of the toxic military culture.
- Culture: The screenplay portrays a military culture that is characterized by strict discipline, hierarchy, and secrecy. This culture is often at odds with the characters' personal values and beliefs. For example, the main character, Kaffee, is a lawyer who believes in justice and fairness, but he must navigate a system that is often unjust and unfair. The conflict between individual and collective is a central theme of the screenplay.
- Society: The screenplay depicts a society that is divided along class and racial lines. The main characters are all white, middle-class professionals, while the defendants are young, working-class Marines. This division is reflected in the way that the characters are treated by the justice system. The defendants are often treated unfairly, and their voices are often ignored.
- Technology: The screenplay makes use of various technologies, including guns, telephones, and computers. These technologies are often used to create a sense of urgency and suspense. For example, the use of guns in the film is a reminder of the violence that is always present in the military. The discovery of a dead body in the film brings into stark reality the potential cost of war and conflict.
- Characters influence: The world elements shape the characters' experiences and actions in a number of ways. The physical environment, for example, can be used to create a sense of isolation and claustrophobia, which can lead to feelings of anxiety and desperation. The military culture, with its emphasis on discipline and hierarchy, can lead to feelings of alienation and powerlessness. The division along class and racial lines can lead to feelings of injustice and resentment.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay in a number of ways. The physical environment, for example, can be used to create a sense of tension and suspense. The military culture, with its emphasis on secrecy and loyalty, can lead to a sense of mystery and intrigue. The division along class and racial lines can lead to a sense of conflict and division.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay in a number of ways. The physical environment, for example, can be used to explore themes of isolation and confinement. The military culture, with its emphasis on hierarchy and discipline, can be used to explore themes of authority and obedience. The division along class and racial lines can be used to explore themes of justice and equality.
| Voice Analysis | |
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| Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by sharp, witty dialogue, realistic character interactions, and a focus on moral dilemmas. The dialogue is fast-paced, engaging, and filled with tension, reflecting the complex dynamics between characters. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice adds depth and complexity to the screenplay, enhancing the character dynamics, exploring themes of justice, loyalty, and integrity, and creating a compelling narrative that keeps the audience engaged. |
| Best Representation Scene | 1 - Arrival at Guantanamo Bay |
| Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's sharp dialogue, realistic character interactions, and focus on moral dilemmas. The fast-paced and engaging dialogue sets the tone for the screenplay, highlighting the tension and complexity of the relationships between the characters. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
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| High Scores correlate with Suspenseful/Intense/Confrontational Tones | Scenes with tones marked as "Suspenseful," "Intense," or "Confrontational" tend to receive higher overall grades. |
| High Dialogue Scores correlate with Sarcastic/Confrontational Tones | Scenes with sarcastic or confrontational tones often receive higher dialogue scores. |
| High Emotional Impact Scores correlate with Intense/Suspenseful Tones | Scenes marked as "Intense" or "Suspenseful" tend to have higher emotional impact scores. |
| High Stakes Scenes tend to have higher Character Change Scores | Scenes with higher stakes often lead to more significant character changes. |
| Scenes with High Stakes tend to receive higher Overall Grades | Scenes with higher stakes tend to be more engaging and receive higher overall grades. |
| Confrontational Scenes tend to have higher Conflict Scores | Scenes with confrontational tones typically have higher conflict scores. |
| Scenes that Move the Story Forward tend to have higher Plot Scores | Scenes that advance the plot tend to receive higher plot scores. |
| Scenes with Authoritative Tones tend to receive higher Character Scores | Scenes where characters display authority or expertise tend to have higher character scores. |
| Scenes with Serious Tones have higher Scores Overall | Scenes marked as "Serious" tend to receive higher overall grades compared to scenes with other tones. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The analyzed screenplay demonstrates strong writing craft, showcasing the writer's ability to create engaging and compelling scenes. The dialogue is sharp and witty, the characters are well-developed, and the pacing is effective. The writer skillfully balances humor, drama, and moral complexity, resulting in a well-rounded and thought-provoking narrative.
Key Improvement Areas
Character Development and Moral Complexity
The screenplay effectively explores moral dilemmas and ethical conflicts, but further development of character motivations and backstories would enhance the emotional depth and relatability of the characters.
Dialogue
While the dialogue is strong, honing the writer's ability to create distinct character voices and subtext will elevate the dialogue and make it even more engaging and impactful.
Pacing and Structure
The pacing is well-controlled, but refining the transitions and flow between scenes can improve the overall rhythm and impact of the screenplay.
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Screenplay | Read 'A Few Good Men' screenplay by Aaron Sorkin | This screenplay excels in character development, sharp dialogue, and thematic depth, providing valuable lessons for crafting compelling characters and engaging scenes. |
| Book | Syd Field's 'Screenplay: The Foundations of Screenwriting' | This comprehensive guide offers techniques and insights on screenplay structure, character development, and storytelling that can help improve pacing, scene transitions, and overall narrative flow. |
| Exercise | Practice writing character backstories and profilesPractice In SceneProv | Exploring characters' motivations, fears, and desires in detail will enhance their depth and make their actions more believable and emotionally resonant. |
| Exercise | Dialogue exercises focusing on subtext and character voicePractice In SceneProv | Writing dialogue that conveys unspoken emotions and reveals character traits through subtle nuances will strengthen the impact of the dialogue and make the characters more distinct. |
| Exercise | Practice outlining and structuring the screenplayPractice In SceneProv | Creating a clear outline and understanding the flow of the story will enable the writer to refine the pacing, ensure smooth scene transitions, and build towards a satisfying climax and resolution. |
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The writer's unique voice and ability to create compelling conflicts and emotional moments shine through in the screenplay. With continued focus on character development, dialogue refinement, and pacing, the writer has the potential to craft even more powerful and impactful stories.
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| The Military | Several characters are marines and legal officers in the US military. | A story, usually fictional, involving life in the military or a military conflict. Often involves themes of sacrifice, courage, loyalty, and the horrors of war. |
| The Lawyer | Several main characters are lawyers who must defend two marines. | A protagonist or supporting character is a lawyer, often facing a difficult case or moral dilemma. |
| The Courtroom Drama | Much of the film revolves around a military trial. | A story set in a courtroom or other legal setting, often involving a trial or other legal proceeding. |
| The Whistleblower | Santiago wrote letters alleging illegal activities which started the plot of the movie. | A character who reports wrongdoing or illegal activity, often at great personal risk. |
| The Code of Silence | The culture of the marines prevents characters like Santiago and Howard from speaking up and they are intimidated into silence. | A social or cultural norm that prevents people from reporting wrongdoing or speaking out against authority figures. |
| The Honor Code | The Marines use honor as a justification for the code red. | A moral code or set of principles that guides the behavior of a group or individual. |
| The Power of Truth | The truth about the code red is eventually revealed and the guilty parties are held accountable. | The idea that truth is ultimately more powerful than lies and deceit. |
| The Triumph of the Underdog | Santiago and the defendants are lower-ranking marines who are able to stand up to their superiors and win justice. | A story in which a small or powerless character or group overcomes great odds to achieve success. |
| The Ensemble Cast | Several lawyers from the judge advocate are seen assisting. | A story with a large cast of characters who play significant roles. |
| The Mentor | Kaffee serves as a mentor to Sam. | A character who provides guidance and support to a younger or less experienced character. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Some Loglines to consider:
| An inexperienced lawyer is assigned to defend two Marines accused of murder, but he matures during the trial and uncovers a conspiracy involving high-ranking officials. |
| The trial of two Marines accused of murder takes an unexpected turn when their commanding officer confesses to ordering the code red, leading to a shocking revelation. |
| In a legal drama that unfolds during a trial, a skilled lawyer uncovers a conspiracy involving high-ranking officials in the military, which puts the lives of two Marines at stake. |
| The trial of two Marines accused of murder sets the stage for an intense legal battle, where the defense lawyer tries to prove their innocence by uncovering a web of lies and corruption. |
| A legal drama that follows the trial of two Marines accused of murder turns into a high-stakes case involving a conspiracy within the military, as the defense lawyer fights to clear his clients' names. |
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'A Few Good Men' is a well-crafted and compelling legal drama that delves into the complex world of military culture and the challenges of upholding justice. The narrative structure is strong, with a clear story arc, well-developed characters, and a compelling central conflict. The courtroom scenes are particularly well-written, with dynamic dialogue and effective character development. The screenplay explores themes of duty, honor, and the complexities of military culture in a thought-provoking and nuanced manner. While there are some areas that could be improved, such as the pacing of the early scenes and the exploration of the characters' emotional journeys, the overall strength of the screenplay makes it a strong candidate for consideration.
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Explanation: The screenplay 'A Few Good Men' offers a compelling courtroom drama centered around themes of honor, duty, and the moral complexities of obedience. The narrative is well-structured with strong character arcs, particularly for Lt. Kaffee, who experiences significant personal growth. The climax is particularly strong, providing a satisfying resolution to the intense build-up.