severance (TV)

Executive Summary

Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend

This changed recently. Ratings are subjective. So you get two engines' ratings to compare.

Engine: Gemini

Recommend

Explanation: Severance is a highly original and thought-provoking screenplay with strong potential. The concept is unique and engaging, the dialogue is sharp and witty, and the world-building is excellent. However, the pacing could be tightened, and some characters could be further developed. Overall, Severance is a compelling story that is sure to generate interest from audiences and networks.

Engine: GPT4

Recommend

Explanation: Severance is a compelling and intellectually engaging screenplay that explores deep themes of identity and memory through a unique narrative structure. The protagonist's journey is well-developed, and the dialogue is sharp and meaningful. While the pacing could be improved and some scenes simplified for clarity, the overall narrative is strong and offers significant potential for a thought-provoking film.

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Overview

Genres: Drama, Mystery, Thriller, Sci-Fi, Psychological Thriller, Psychological, Dark Comedy, Crime, Science Fiction

Setting: Present day or near future, Unclear, but features an office building, a suburban neighborhood, and a forest

Overview: The screenplay boasts a strong overall score of 8.1, reflecting its compelling premise, engaging characters, and thought-provoking themes. Its originality and unpredictable nature create a captivating experience, while the exploration of identity and corporate control resonates deeply with contemporary audiences. However, opportunities exist to refine pacing, character development, and emotional depth to elevate the screenplay to its full potential.

Themes: Identity and Existence, Control and Power, Isolation and Alienation, Choice and Morality, Existential Dread, Grief and Loss, Duality and Paradox

Conflict and Stakes: Mark's struggle to uncover the truth about his past and present, as well as the ethical implications of the severance procedure. The stakes include Mark's identity, his relationship with his colleagues, and the well-being of the overall organization.

Overall Mood: Tense, mysterious, and unsettling, with a sense of paranoia and uncertainty

Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:

Scene 1: The opening scene, where Mark wakes up on the table in the sterile room, immediately creates a sense of disorientation and unease.

Scene 5: The scene where Mark is pursued by security guards through the maze of cubicles, is a tense and chaotic sequence that highlights Mark's vulnerability and desperation.

Scene 12: The scene where Mark watches the tape of his interview with Harmony Cobel, is a pivotal moment that reveals the true nature of the severance procedure and the company's sinister intentions.

Standout Features:

Unique Hook: The concept of severance, which allows employees to have their work memories surgically separated from their personal memories.

Plot Twist : The revelation that Mark's decision to undergo severance was not as simple as it seemed and that he had a deeper connection to the company than he initially realized.

Distinctive Setting : The mysterious and isolated office building where the severance procedure takes place, creating a sense of unease and uncertainty.

Innovative Idea : The exploration of the ethical implications of the severance procedure and the question of what it means to be truly human.

Unique Characters : The eccentric and enigmatic characters who work at Lumon, each with their own motivations and secrets.

Genre Blend : The screenplay blends elements of psychological thriller, science fiction, and dark comedy, creating a unique and captivating cinematic experience.

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The Matrix

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The Prisoner

The Adjustment Bureau

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Black Mirror: White Christmas

1984

The Game

Market Analysis

Budget Estimate:Likely between $10-20 million

Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of psychological thrillers, science fiction, and philosophical dramas

Marketability: The screenplay has a unique and intriguing concept, a talented cast, and explores timely and relevant themes. It has the potential to attract a wide audience and generate buzz.

While the screenplay has a strong concept and well-written characters, its unconventional narrative structure and dark themes may limit its appeal to mainstream audiences.

The screenplay's high production value, talented cast, and timely themes could appeal to streaming services and limited theatrical release, ensuring a solid return on investment.

Profit Potential: Likely moderate to high, depending on production costs and marketing effectiveness. The screenplay has the potential to generate revenue through theatrical release, streaming services, and international distribution.

Scene Level Percentiles

The screenplay excels in originality, concept, and unpredictability but would benefit from refinement in plot, character development, pacing, and structure to fully realize its potential.

Script Level Percentiles

**The method of calculating these has just changed**
Characters: 7.6 See More
Premise: 8.9 See More
Structure: 7.5 See More
Theme: 8.7 See More
Visual Impact: 7.7 See More
Emotional Impact: 7.4 See More
Conflict: 7.7 See More
Originality: 8.4 See More

Emotions Elicited Percentiles

Robert McKee: "The audience doesn’t go to the movies to see plot; they go to feel emotion, to be moved."
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.

Key Strengths

**Conceptrating (Percentile: 91.87%)**: The screenplay presents a highly original and captivating central idea or concept.
**Originality (Percentile: 97.89%)**: The screenplay stands out for its unique and unconventional storytelling elements, characters, or plotlines.
**Unpredictability (Percentile: 97.92%)**: The screenplay keeps the audience engaged and guessing through unexpected twists and turns in the narrative.

Areas for Improvement

**Plot (Percentile: 20.73%)**: The screenplay may benefit from a stronger and more engaging plot structure, pacing, and overall narrative flow.
**Characters (Percentile: 14.23%)**: The screenplay could develop more compelling and well-rounded characters with clear motivations and arcs.
**Pacing (Percentile: 13.16%)**: The screenplay may need to adjust its pacing to ensure a smoother and more engaging reading experience for the audience.
**Structure (Percentile: 29.47%)**: The screenplay's structure could be improved to enhance its overall flow, cohesion, and impact.

Writer Style

Based on the percentile patterns, the writer exhibits strengths in conceptualizing original and unconventional ideas. The high scores in conceptrating, originality, and unpredictability suggest a potential for crafting unique and captivating stories.

Balancing Elements

To enhance the screenplay's overall effectiveness, the writer could consider balancing the strong conceptual elements with equally compelling character development and plot execution.
Finding a balance between originality and accessibility can ensure that the unique storytelling elements resonate with a broader audience.
Improving the pacing and structure will complement the screenplay's strong conceptual foundation, creating a more engaging and immersive reading experience.

Intuition Level

Conceptual writer

Overall Assessment

The screenplay showcases a strong conceptual foundation and originality, providing a solid starting point for further development. By addressing the areas for improvement, the writer has the potential to craft a compelling and well-rounded screenplay that captivates the audience with its unique storytelling and character dynamics.

How this was done: Each criteria is ranked in comparison to scripts in our Vault (such as The Matrix, Breaking Bad, etc.) This allows you to see where you stand compared to other produced scripts for each criteria.

How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library

Note: The ratings are the averages of all the scenes.

Title	Grade	Percentile	Before	After
Scene Unpredictability	8.19	99	Jack Reacher: 8.09	severance (TV): 8.19
Scene Originality	9.00	98	Beetlejuice: 8.98	severance (TV): 9.00
Script Premise	8.90	95	Interstellar: 8.80	Titanic: 8.90
Scene Internal Goal	8.25	87	Interstellar: 8.24	severance (TV): 8.25
Scene Concept	8.4	84	The King's speech: 8.3	fight Club: 8.4
Script Theme	8.70	82	The Founder: 8.60	severance (TV): 8.70
Scene Engagement	9.00	81	The Addams Family: 8.99	fight Club: 9.00
Script Originality	8.40	79	Ghostbusters: 8.30	Casablanca: 8.40
Script Conflict	7.70	61	12 years a slave: 7.60	severance (TV): 7.70
Scene External Goal	7.25	53	Conclave: 7.24	severance (TV): 7.25
Scene Conflict Level	7.6	51	Triangle of sadness: 7.5	Titanic: 7.6
Overall Script	8.10	51	Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 8.06	the pursuit of happyness: 8.10
Script Visual Impact	7.70	48	American Fiction: 7.60	face/off: 7.70
Scene Dialogue	7.8	46	Ted: 7.7	the dark knight rises: 7.8
Scene High Stakes	7.3	43	The father: 7.2	severance (TV): 7.3
Scene Story Forward	8.0	41	American Fiction: 7.9	severance (TV): 8.0
Scene Overall	8.3	41	The Umbrella Academy: 8.2	fight Club: 8.3
Scene Character Changes	6.9	40	500 days of summer: 6.8	severance (TV): 6.9
Scene Emotional Impact	7.7	40	Jack Reacher: 7.6	severance (TV): 7.7
Scene Formatting	8.06	27	12 years a slave: 8.05	Casablanca: 8.06
Script Structure	8.06	26	12 years a slave: 8.05	severance (TV): 8.06
Scene Pacing	8.13	22	American Fiction: 8.12	severance (TV): 8.13
Scene Plot	7.6	21	Birdman: 7.5	severance (TV): 7.6
Script Structure	7.50	21	The father: 7.40	severance (TV): 7.50
Script Emotional Impact	7.40	20	Stranger Things: 7.30	severance (TV): 7.40
Script Characters	7.60	19	Witness: 7.50	severance (TV): 7.60
Scene Characters	7.9	12	El Mariachi: 7.8	severance (TV): 7.9

Writer's Voice

Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and witty dialogue, existential themes, and a blend of humor and mystery, creating a distinct and engaging tone.

Best representation: Scene Scene 12. This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases the blend of dark humor, surreal dialogue, and existential themes that define the script. The dialogue is sharp and witty, revealing the characters' inner thoughts and motivations, while the discussion of the job offer and the consequences of accepting it raises questions about morality, identity, and the nature of work.

Memorable Lines:

Mark: I'm never going to leave here. (Scene 16)
MARK: What kind of monster am I? Who hits a cat and then drives off to interview for a job no sane person would even want? (Scene 10)
Mark: I'm being held here. I'm being held against my will. (Scene 2)
Woman: I want to see my baby! (Scene 7)
Helly: Because you’re more likely to accept it once they’ve broken you some. (Scene 6)

Writing Style:

The screenplay displays a unique and eclectic blend of writing styles, incorporating elements of suspense, mystery, surrealism, dark humor, and philosophical depth. The scenes often explore complex psychological dynamics, existential themes, and unconventional storytelling techniques.

Style Similarities:

Charlie Kaufman
David Lynch
Christopher Nolan

Other Similarities: The screenplay also demonstrates influences from other notable screenwriters and filmmakers, such as Yorgos Lanthimos, Quentin Tarantino, and Richard Linklater. This blend of styles creates a cohesive yet distinctive voice for the screenplay.

Story Shape

Emotions Elicited

Engine: Gemini

Screenplay Rating:

Recommend

Executive Summary

Severance is a highly original and thought-provoking screenplay with strong potential. The concept is unique and engaging, the dialogue is sharp and witty, and the world-building is excellent. However, the pacing could be tightened, and some characters could be further developed. Overall, Severance is a compelling story that is sure to generate interest from audiences and networks.

Strengths

The concept of 'severance' is highly original and thought-provoking, offering a unique perspective on work-life balance and the potential dangers of technology. high
The dialogue is sharp, witty, and often darkly humorous, effectively balancing the unsettling aspects of the story. high ( Scene 2 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 10 Scene 11 )
The initial mystery surrounding the severance procedure and Lumon Industries effectively hooks the audience and creates a sense of intrigue. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 7 )
The world-building is excellent, with the sterile, unsettling atmosphere of Lumon Industries and the contrasting outside world creating a sense of unease and mystery. medium
Cobel is a fascinating and complex antagonist, whose motivations and methods are both disturbing and intriguing. medium ( Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 )

Areas of Improvement

The pacing can be slow at times, particularly in the middle section of the script. Some scenes could be tightened or removed to maintain momentum. medium
Mark's outside life could be explored in more depth to provide greater context for his character and motivations. medium ( Scene 9 Scene 10 )
The introduction of Mark's coworkers could be more engaging, perhaps by highlighting their individual personalities and quirks. low ( Scene 5 )
While intriguing, the characters of Irving and Helly remain somewhat underdeveloped in the pilot episode. low ( Scene 4 Scene 6 Scene 16 )

MissingElements

The pilot episode raises many questions about the severance procedure and Lumon Industries, but provides few answers. While this is effective in creating intrigue, it could also leave some viewers frustrated. medium

NotablePoints

The scene with Cobel and the rat is a powerful and disturbing illustration of the potential consequences of the severance procedure. high ( Scene 13 )
The use of the Port-O-Potty as a symbol of confinement and escape is both humorous and thought-provoking. medium ( Scene 1 Scene 15 )

Engine: Claude

Screenplay Rating:

Recommend

Executive Summary

The screenplay for 'Severance' presents a captivating and thought-provoking narrative that explores the ethical and psychological implications of dissociating an individual's work and personal identities. The central premise of the 'severance' procedure, where employees are implanted with work-specific memories and skills, is a compelling hook that drives the story forward and raises a multitude of questions about the nature of identity, free will, and the boundaries between personal and professional life. The characters, while initially enigmatic, are well-developed and compelling, each with their own distinct motivations and struggles that contribute to the overall sense of mystery and tension. The nonlinear structure and the inclusion of unseen, ominous figures further enhance the narrative's intrigue, hinting at a larger, more complex conspiracy at play. While the pacing and development of some supporting characters could be tightened, the overall strength of the screenplay lies in its ability to captivate the audience and leave them with thought-provoking questions about the nature of reality and the human experience.

Strengths

The screenplay effectively establishes a sense of mystery and intrigue from the very beginning, drawing the audience into an unfolding narrative that raises more questions than it answers. high
The characters, though enigmatic, are well-developed and compelling, each with their own distinct personalities and motivations that drive the story forward. high
The underlying premise of the 'severance' procedure is a fascinating and thought-provoking concept, exploring the ethical implications of dissociating an individual's work and personal identities. high
The screenplay maintains a consistent tone of unease and suspense, creating a captivating atmosphere that keeps the audience engaged throughout. medium
The nonlinear structure, with flashbacks and jumps in time, adds depth and complexity to the narrative, allowing for deeper exploration of the characters' backstories and the larger mystery at hand. medium

Areas of Improvement

While the overall narrative is compelling, there are moments where the pacing could be tightened, particularly during the orientation and onboarding process for the new employee, Mark. medium
Some of the supporting characters, such as Dylan and Irving, could benefit from further development and exploration, as they currently feel somewhat one-dimensional in comparison to the central figures. medium
The introduction of the 'beacons' and the mechanics of the 'severance' procedure could be explained in more detail, to fully grasp the implications and potential consequences of this technology. medium

MissingElements

While the screenplay provides a strong foundation for the central mystery, there is limited exploration of the broader societal or corporate context in which this story takes place. Providing more insight into the world outside the 'Severed' office could enhance the narrative's depth and complexity. medium
The screenplay could benefit from a more distinct and memorable central theme or message, beyond the exploration of the 'severance' concept itself. Incorporating a stronger thematic undercurrent could elevate the narrative's significance and impact. medium

NotablePoints

The exploration of the 'severance' procedure and its psychological and emotional impact on the characters is a compelling and unique premise that sets this screenplay apart from more conventional workplace narratives. high
The nonlinear structure and the use of flashbacks and time jumps create a sense of disorientation and uncertainty, mirroring the experience of the characters and heightening the overall sense of mystery. medium
The introduction of the unseen, ominous figures who seem to be in control of the 'severance' process adds an intriguing layer of menace and intrigue to the narrative, hinting at a larger, more complex conspiracy at play. medium

Engine: GPT4

Screenplay Rating:

Recommend

Executive Summary

Severance is a compelling and intellectually engaging screenplay that explores deep themes of identity and memory through a unique narrative structure. The protagonist's journey is well-developed, and the dialogue is sharp and meaningful. While the pacing could be improved and some scenes simplified for clarity, the overall narrative is strong and offers significant potential for a thought-provoking film.

Strengths

The screenplay effectively creates suspense and intrigue, particularly in the opening and the climactic scenes, drawing the audience into the mystery of the protagonist's situation. high ( Scene 1 Scene 14 )
Strong character development, especially with the protagonist, Mark, whose journey from confusion to a deeper, unsettling realization about his life and choices is compelling. high ( Scene 12 Scene 13 )
The dialogue is sharp and often laden with deeper meaning, providing both exposition and character depth efficiently. medium
The screenplay's structure, with its clear acts and escalating tension, supports a strong narrative arc. medium ( Scene 16 )
The unique concept of 'Severance' and its exploration of identity and memory is intellectually stimulating and emotionally engaging. high

Areas of Improvement

Some scenes may benefit from a slight reduction in complexity to enhance clarity without sacrificing the depth of the narrative. medium
The pacing in the middle acts can feel slightly uneven, with some sections dragging while others rush, potentially disorienting the viewer. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 6 )
The emotional transitions of secondary characters could be more developed to enhance their relatability and depth. low
Greater use of visual storytelling could enhance the screenplay, reducing the reliance on dialogue for exposition. medium
The ending could be expanded to provide a more satisfying resolution to the protagonist's journey, potentially exploring the long-term implications of his choices. medium

MissingElements

There is a need for more distinct and memorable settings that could further enhance the mood and themes of the screenplay. low

NotablePoints

The screenplay's exploration of themes such as identity, memory, and personal autonomy is both timely and timeless, resonating with contemporary societal issues. high

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Screenplay Insights:

Characters: 7.6, The screenplay demonstrates strengths in its character development through Mark's complex and introspective journey, the manipulative and enigmatic nature of Cobel, and the quirky innocence of Irving. However, there are opportunities to refine the characters and their arcs to enhance the screenplay's overall emotional impact and connection with the audience. See More

Premise: 8.9, The screenplay presents a highly intriguing and original premise with strong potential to engage the audience. The concept of memory separation and its psychological and ethical implications create a compelling narrative hook. However, further clarity is needed regarding the organization's motives and the overall goal of the 'severance' program to enhance long-term audience investment. See More

Structure: 7.5, The screenplay presents a largely coherent and engaging plot with intriguing narrative elements, especially in its exploration of identity, memory, and workplace dynamics. However, it could benefit from tighter pacing, clearer motivation for some of its twists, and a more satisfying resolution to fully captivate the audience and leave a lasting impact. See More

Theme: 8.7, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes and messages through a compelling narrative and well-developed characters. The exploration of identity, memory, and corporate control resonates deeply with the audience, raising thought-provoking questions and leaving a lasting impact. However, further refinement of the message's clarity and originality could enhance the screenplay's overall thematic impact. See More

Visual Impact: 7.7, The screenplay presents a compelling visual foundation with a blend of striking visuals and inventive elements. The clear and evocative descriptions effectively transport readers into the enigmatic world of the story, capturing their imagination and setting the stage for a visually captivating cinematic experience. See More

Emotional Impact: 7.4, The screenplay has the potential for a powerful emotional impact on the audience, with a strong foundation in introducing the characters and their conflicts. However, the emotional depth and resonance could be further enhanced by delving deeper into the characters' inner struggles, providing a more nuanced and complex emotional journey. See More

Conflict: 7.7, The screenplay presents a compelling central conflict and high stakes, effectively driving the narrative and engaging the audience. The unfolding mystery and Mark's struggle for identity create a strong foundation for tension and engagement. However, the screenplay can further enhance conflict resolution and explore the consequences and implications in greater depth to maximize its impact. See More

Originality: 8.4, The screenplay demonstrates strong originality and creativity in its enigmatic premise, engaging characters, and thought-provoking exploration of identity and free will. The narrative's non-linear structure and surreal elements create a distinctive and immersive experience. However, the story's pacing and character development could benefit from further refinement to enhance its overall impact and emotional resonance. See More

Summary The screenplay follows the journey of Mark, a confused and disoriented man who finds himself in a mysterious organization where his memories are split between work and personal life. Mark faces conflicts with the enigmatic figures of Cobel and Milchick, who offer him a job with a unique condition. Despite his hesitation, Mark ultimately decides to undergo the severance procedure. The scene ends with Mark stepping into the dark hallway of the organization, leaving his fate unknown.

Screenplay Story Analysis

Story Critique The screenplay presents an intriguing and mysterious premise that hooks the audience from the beginning. The character development is strong, especially with Mark's journey of self-discovery and Cobel's enigmatic nature. The plot unfolds in a way that keeps the audience engaged and curious about the world and characters. However, the story could benefit from clearer foreshadowing of Cobel's true motives and a more seamless integration of the various subplots. The ending feels rushed and leaves some questions unanswered, which may leave the audience feeling unsatisfied.

Suggestions: To improve the screenplay, consider adding more subtle hints and foreshadowing of Cobel's true intentions throughout the story to build tension and intrigue. Streamline the subplots to ensure they all contribute to the main narrative and character arcs. Develop the ending further to provide a more satisfying resolution and address any lingering questions or loose ends.

Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here

Beginning The beginning of the screenplay effectively establishes a sense of mystery and intrigue with Mark waking up in a strange environment. The character introductions are engaging, especially with the enigmatic Cobel and quirky Irving. The initial scenes set up the central conflict and character arcs well, drawing the audience into the story. However, there could be more clarity in Mark's initial motivations and reactions to his situation, as well as a smoother transition between scenes to maintain the pacing.

Suggestions: To enhance the beginning of the screenplay, consider providing more insight into Mark's initial thoughts and emotions as he navigates the unfamiliar environment. Ensure that each scene flows seamlessly into the next to maintain the momentum and keep the audience engaged. Clarify the stakes and goals for Mark early on to establish a strong foundation for his character arc and the overall plot.

Middle The middle part of the screenplay delves deeper into the characters' relationships and the inner workings of the mysterious world they inhabit. The character development continues to be a strong point, especially with Helly's evolution from a rule-follower to a rebel leader. The plot thickens with intriguing revelations and conflicts, keeping the audience invested in the story. However, there are moments where the pacing slows down, and some scenes could be tightened to maintain the tension and momentum.

Suggestions: To improve the middle part of the screenplay, consider tightening the pacing in certain scenes to keep the audience engaged and maintain the momentum of the plot. Explore the relationships between the characters further to add depth and complexity to their interactions. Introduce more obstacles and challenges for the characters to overcome, heightening the stakes and driving the narrative forward.

Ending The ending of the screenplay delivers a climactic resolution to the central conflict but leaves some questions unanswered. The character arcs come to a satisfying conclusion, especially with Mark's decision and Cobel's true motives being revealed. However, the resolution feels rushed and could benefit from more development to provide a more impactful and emotionally resonant ending for the audience.

Suggestions: To enhance the ending of the screenplay, consider expanding on the resolution to address any lingering questions or loose ends in the plot. Develop the final moments to provide a more satisfying and emotionally resonant conclusion for the characters and the audience. Ensure that the ending ties up all the major plot threads and character arcs in a cohesive and impactful way.

CharacterInconsistencies

Character Mark
Description Mark's initial panic and resistance to the situation seem to dissipate quickly, especially after encountering Helly in the men's room. His transition to accepting his role as a culler feels somewhat abrupt, given his earlier distress and confusion.
( Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 )
Character Helly
Description Helly's claim of forgetting to use the women's restroom and her subsequent conversation with Irving feel slightly out of character, given her otherwise strong and independent personality.
( Scene 6 )

StoryInconsistencies

Description The sudden appearance of a Port-o-Potty in place of Cobel's house and the disappearance of the house itself raise questions about the extent and limitations of the company's capabilities. The lack of explanation for this event creates a significant gap in the story's internal logic.
( Scene 15 )

PlotHoles

Description The method by which Cobel obtained such specific and personal information about Mark, including his suicidal thoughts, remains unclear. While she mentions looking him up after the cat incident, the level of detail she possesses seems implausible.
( Scene 12 Scene 13 )

DialogueAuthenticity

Description Milchick's overly enthusiastic and verbose dialogue, while intended to be humorous, can sometimes feel forced and unnatural, particularly during the orientation scene.
( Scene 2 )

Redundancies

Element Dialogue about the video
( Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 )
Suggestion The repeated mentions of the video and its importance could be streamlined to maintain a sense of mystery and intrigue. Perhaps the characters could allude to its contents without explicitly stating its purpose, allowing the audience to gradually discover its significance.

Mark - Score: 84/100

Role

Protagonist

Personality

MBTI: INTJ
Enneagram: Type 5 (The Investigator)

Scenes

Strongest: #2
Weakest: #5

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 9/10

Mark's disorientation leads to a struggle for autonomy.

Complexity And Depth 8/10

Mark grapples with emotional vulnerabilities and helplessness.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 7/10

Mark's journey showcases a struggle for identity and control.

Dialogue And Voice 8/10

Mark's dialogue reflects confusion and a yearning for clarity.

Behavior And Choices 9/10

Mark's choices reflect his desperation and desire for autonomy.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Mark's interactions reveal layers of his character and conflict.

Scene Impact 8/10

Mark’s presence drives scenes with tension and emotional weight.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

Mark embodies the protagonist role by seeking autonomy.

Thematic Plot Integration 9/10

Mark’s journey underlines themes of identity and autonomy.

Emotional Resonance 9/10

Mark provokes empathy and emotional tension throughout.

Foundational Definition

Score: 9

Mark is a mid-30s man who wakes up naked and disoriented in a sterile board room, unable to remember where he is or how he got there. This disorientation reflects a broader theme of lost identity, as Mark appears to have been severed from his past life. His interactions in the orientation indicate he values autonomy and self-awareness but finds himself in a situation where both are compromised. This foundational trauma shapes his initial reactions to the scenario he finds himself in, driven by a desire to regain control and understand his circumstances.

Values And Beliefs: Autonomy, self-awareness, understanding of personal identity

Strengths And Skills: Problem-solving, adaptability, innate curiosity

Suggestions

Further explore Mark's memories or flashbacks to deepen his backstory.
Introduce a moment where Mark's problem-solving skills help him navigate his surreal environment.

Follow-up Questions

What unresolved aspects of Mark's identity could emerge as critical themes?
How might Mark's character evolve if he uncovers more of his past?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 8

Mark displays emotional vulnerability, evidenced by his tearful moments and panic when faced with questions about his identity (e.g., the survey conducted via intercom). His flaws surface in a sense of helplessness and frustration at being powerless in a surreal and threatening environment. Emotionally, he grapples with the implications of losing his autonomy, and we see the beginnings of an internal struggle that could influence his choices moving forward.

Character Wound: Loss of identity and autonomy

Character Flaws: Helplessness, frustration, disorientation

Suggestions

Elaborate on Mark's backstory to explain his current emotional state.
Build a moment where he confronts his flaws directly with another character.

Follow-up Questions

How do Mark's emotional vulnerabilities affect his decision-making?
What key moments may highlight his internal conflict?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 7

Mark’s journey oscillates between moments of realization about his surroundings and attempts at panic-fueled escape. He grapples with his identity, shown through flashbacks and conversations that reveal layers of emotional trauma. Mark’s continued struggle against the oppressive atmosphere of the workplace suggests a resistance to his severance, leading to a potential climax in his character arc where he confronts the reality of his choices.

Polarity Changes: Discovery of the peculiar nature of his job versus his desperate need for escape.

Transformation Triggers: His interactions with Cobel and his allies in the office environment.

Suggestions

Clarify the moment where Mark realizes the full implications of his job.
Set up scenarios that make Mark question his current path frequently.

Follow-up Questions

What pivotal moments may catalyze Mark’s transformation?
How might other characters facilitate or obstruct his development?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 8

Through his dialogue, Mark exemplifies confusion as he questions everything around him. His inquiries often reveal his emotional state and reflect inner turmoil. The way he interacts with characters like Cobel showcases his struggle to regain clarity amidst the chaos, creating a voice that resonates with the audience's empathy.

Unique Voice: Direct, often embodies a tone of desperation and confusion

Suggestions

Inject more moments of humor or irony in Mark's dialogue to balance tension.
Use dialogue to reveal deeper truths about Mark’s past and motivations.

Follow-up Questions

How does Mark's character voice help in emphasizing his emotional state?
What kinds of exchanges might best represent Mark's internal conflict?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 9

Mark’s behavior throughout the screenplay reveals a man struggling to assert himself amid an absurd and frightening reality. His choices—like attempting to escape and questioning authority—exemplify a deep-seated drive for autonomy and clarity. However, these choices also suggest an underlying fear, emphasizing his conflict between wanting to obey and yearning to break free.

Motivations: Regaining control and understanding his situation.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires freedom and understanding; needs to confront his identity.

Suggestions

Highlight more instances where Mark actively seeks to assert control.
Create dilemmas that force Mark to choose between self-preservation and helping others.

Follow-up Questions

What critical moments could illustrate Mark's motivations more sharply?
How do Mark's behavioral choices affect those around him in the workplace?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

Mark's relationships with characters like Milchick and Cobel illustrate his struggles against authoritative control while simultaneously revealing vulnerabilities. Cobel's authoritative nature juxtaposes Mark’s helplessness, creating tension and conflict. His emerging allegiances and dynamic with co-workers highlight his journey toward understanding himself and his choices in the face of oppression.

Suggestions

Deepen the relationships by including more back-and-forth dialogue.
Introduce moments of vulnerability in Mark’s interactions with his colleagues.

Follow-up Questions

What do Mark's relationships reveal about his character growth?
How might the dynamics shift as Mark learns more about his situation?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

In various scenes, Mark's complex emotional responses create tension as he navigates the unfamiliar and threatening world around him. His desperate attempted escape and confused inquiries draw the audience into his plight, making his emotional struggles and eventual decisions pivotal in shaping the narrative's direction.

Suggestions

Increase Mark’s emotional stakes in tense scenes to elevate impact.
Explore Mark’s understanding and impact on other characters in pivotal sequences.

Follow-up Questions

In which scenes does Mark's emotional weight most significantly alter the tone?
How can Mark's actions create changes in the surrounding environment?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

Mark's role as the protagonist is solidified by his journey to reclaim his identity amidst an oppressive system. His resistance to the circumstances he finds himself in and the desire to uncover the truth about his life underscores a broader theme of individuality versus systemic control, making his character a symbolic representation of the fight for personal freedom.

Symbolic Role: Represents the struggle between individuality vs. conformity.

Suggestions

Clarify Mark's symbolic role through key confrontations.
Subvert expectations by introducing unforeseen outside influences.

Follow-up Questions

How can Mark's journey reflects greater societal themes?
What moments accentuate his role as a rebel against conformity?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 9

Mark's struggle with his severed identity is deeply interwoven with the screenplay's themes of autonomy, existence, and the consequences of workplace control. His actions in seeking to uncover the truth about himself and his situation resonate with larger questions about purpose and individual agency. This connection positions him as a vital component of the screenplay’s thematic exploration.

Suggestions

Enhance parallels between Mark's struggles and broader societal themes.
Introduce additional thematic elements that challenge Mark's views as the narrative unfolds.

Follow-up Questions

What thematic issues could be explored through Mark’s relationships?
How does Mark's evolution add to the overall thematic depth of the screenplay?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 9

Mark evokes strong emotional responses from the audience through his feelings of confusion, desperation, and vulnerability. His plight resonates deeply, allowing viewers to connect with his struggle for identity and autonomy. These emotional beats tied to his character effectively engage the audience, enhancing the tension throughout the unfolding narrative.

Emotional Impact: Elicits empathy and tension.

Suggestions

Include deeper internal monologues to enhance emotional resonance.
Utilize supporting characters to reflect aspects of Mark’s emotional journey.

Follow-up Questions

What moments most effectively highlight Mark's emotional struggles?
How can his interactions cultivate a stronger viewer connection?

Personality Types

MBTI: intj

Mark displays qualities of introversion through his introspective nature, while his logical responses and strategic approach often align with the INTJ type. His desire for autonomy confirms his intuitive understanding of the complexities in his surroundings.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: infp (50%)

Suggestions

Explore aspects of Mark's inner world that reflect his intuitive side.
Integrate INTJ traits in decision-making moments to enhance consistency.

Follow-up Questions

In what ways does Mark balance introverted and extroverted responses?
How do his personality traits influence his interactions with others?

Enneagram: type 5 (the investigator)

Mark embodies a Type 5 personality, showcasing intense fears of being overwhelmed and a strong desire for knowledge, especially about his situation. His emotional struggles reflect Type 5's challenges with detachment versus connection.

Confidence: 70%

Possible Alternative Type: type 6 (the loyalist) (50%)

Suggestions

Develop situations where Mark’s investigative nature comes into play.
Highlight his fears surrounding knowledge and trust to deepen complexity.

Follow-up Questions

How does Mark's Type 5 behavior manifest in his decisions?
What parts of Mark's journey could reveal more about his fears?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (2)

The moment Mark awakens and interacts with the intercom is pivotal.

Why: It showcases his confusion, desperation, and the oppressive reality of his experience, drawing the audience into his emotional turmoil.

Weakest Scene (5)

Mark's initial introduction to his coworkers lacks tension and emotional depth.

Why: The scene focuses on establishing Mark’s role but doesn’t create immediate conflict or emotional stakes for him.

Suggestions:

Add conflict in Mark's interactions to elevate stakes.
Incorporate emotional reactions from Mark to his new environment.

Cobel - Score: 82/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ENTJ
Enneagram: Type 8 - The Challenger

Scenes

Strongest: #39

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Embodies authority and control over the severance procedure.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

Copes with unresolved emotional wounds; struggles with internal conflicts.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 6/10

Cobel remains largely static in her beliefs throughout the narrative.

Dialogue And Voice 9/10

Cobel speaks with calculated precision, reflecting her dominant personality.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Cobel’s choices are driven by a desire for control and efficiency.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Cobel's relationships are marked by manipulation and authority.

Scene Impact 9/10

Cobel's scenes often generate tension and conflict.

Role Fulfillment 10/10

Cobel fulfills the role of a controlling antagonist.

Thematic Plot Integration 9/10

Cobel’s story arc intertwines with corporate control themes.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Creates strong tension and moral complexity in audience emotions.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Harmony Cobel is a complex character representing authority and control within the mysterious corporation that enforces the 'severance' procedure. Her role is central to the narrative as she embodies the organization’s values of secrecy and conformity while manipulating others to achieve her ends. Cobel’s polished persona and unsettling calm suggest a deep-seated belief in the purpose of her work, seeing it as a noble cause that allows individuals to escape the burdens of their past. This duality shapes her interactions and the lengths she is willing to go to maintain order and secrecy within the workplace.

Values And Beliefs: Believes in the necessity of severance for a happier, focused life; values order and control.

Strengths And Skills: Highly manipulative, charismatic, strategic thinker, emotionally intelligent.

Suggestions

Explore deeper motivations behind her belief in severance to add complexity.
Show more of her interactions outside the workplace to humanize her character.

Follow-up Questions

What experiences led Cobel to believe so strongly in the severance process?
How does Cobel view her relationship with the employees she oversees?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Cobel exhibits a facade of confidence and control that conceals her emotional wounds and vulnerabilities. One of her internal conflicts appears to stem from her unresolved issues related to her upbringing and her mother’s lack of belief. This background may contribute to her need for control and her overwhelming desire to impose order on the chaos of human emotions. As she interacts with Mark, it becomes evident that her own past haunts her, raising questions about her emotional stability and the moral implications of the decisions she makes. This tension could lead to potential growth in her character, pushing her to reflect on the consequences of her actions.

Character Wound: Struggles with the internal conflict stemming from her mother’s beliefs.

Character Flaws: Overly controlling, lacking empathy, manipulative.

Suggestions

Provide moments of vulnerability that reveal her internal conflicts.
Offer insights into her past that could explain her actions.

Follow-up Questions

What are Cobel’s thoughts on the psychological effects of her actions on employees?
Does Cobel seek personal connection, or is she entirely consumed by her role?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 6

Throughout the story, Cobel largely retains her controlling demeanor and adherence to the severance doctrine. While she demonstrates some capacity for empathy and understanding, particularly toward Mark, she firmly believes in the righteousness of her actions. The potential for growth exists, especially as she grapples with the morality of her methods. Key moments, such as her encounters with Mark where she reflects on her past, might lead her toward transformation, though currently, she seems resistant to change.

Polarity Changes: Dramatic interactions with characters challenge her views but ultimately do not change her stances.

Transformation Triggers: Encounters with Mark highlight her emotional capacity and call into question her philosophies.

Suggestions

Introduce more moments of self-doubt or reflection to suggest potential growth.
Allow for moments where her authority is challenged, causing her to reassess her beliefs.

Follow-up Questions

What would it take for Cobel to question her commitment to the severance process?
How does Cobel's perception of her role change after pivotal encounters with Mark?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 9

Cobel's speech is assertive and formal, often utilizing phrases that convey authority while cleverly embedding emotional subtext. Her dialogue reveals her strategic thinking and manipulative tendencies, as she often deflects questions, reframes narratives, and controls conversations to maintain her power. The tone of her voice remains calm, even in tense situations, which enhances her unsettling presence. Cobel's dialogue diversifies through different modes of persuasion, from subtly threatening to congenially manipulative, revealing her character's complexity.

Unique Voice: Employs formal, unsettling dialogue that often carries a dual meaning, showcasing her manipulative nature.

Suggestions

Consider interspersing personal anecdotes to draw out more emotional depth in her dialogue.
Use dialogue to more explicitly show the contrast between her public and private persona.

Follow-up Questions

How can Cobel’s dialogue reveal more about her dark sense of humor?
What phrases or language patterns does Cobel use to manipulate others emotionally?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Cobel's actions consistently reflect her motivations, which revolve around maintaining the organization’s secrecy and control. She believes in the severance process’s ideals to the extent that she is willing to resort to manipulation and intimidation to preserve it. Her repeated choices to deceive or hide information display her commitment to her beliefs, while her steadfast control could potentially cause her downfall if challenged. The duality of her desires and needs illustrates the tension between her personal ambitions and the emotional costs of her decisions.

Motivations: Strives to maintain control over the severance procedure and manage her employees' perceptions.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires control and authority but needs to confront her emotional vulnerabilities.

Suggestions

Emphasize moments where her choices have tangible consequences for others.
Portray moments of hesitation to add depth to her motivations.

Follow-up Questions

What drives Cobel to take personal risks in her efforts to maintain control?
How do her decisions impact the dynamics within the workforce?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

Cobel's connection with other characters is primarily one of authority and manipulation. She exerts a chilling command over employees like Mark, using both charm and intimidation to enforce compliance. Her relationship with Mark reflects a blend of mentor and adversary, as she offers guidance while simultaneously controlling his experience in the company. Her interactions often reveal deeper motivations and the consequences of her authoritative stance, leading to conflicts that unravel essential truths about her character.

Suggestions

Highlight relationships that test her moral convictions.
Explore her dynamic with other characters to add more depth to her villainy.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cobel react when her authority is questioned by subordinates?
What moments challenge her perception of the relationships she builds with others?

Scene Impact

Score: 9

Cobel significantly impacts the emotional tone and direction of scenes. Her presence often escalates tension or unease as she navigates conversations with other characters, particularly Mark. By imparting subtle threats or authoritative commands, she shifts dynamics noticeably in various scenes. Cobel’s actions not only reveal her confidence but also raise critical questions about morality, control, and the consequences of severance, solidifying her role as a formidable antagonist.

Suggestions

Maximize tension in scenes with rapid transitions between calm discussions and confrontational moments.
Introduce stakes that challenge her in crucial scenes to enhance her impact.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cobel's demeanor and presence change in pivotal scenes?
What elements make her interactions particularly charged or impactful?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 10

Cobel embodies the archetype of an antagonist driven by control and secrecy. She symbolizes the dehumanizing effects of corporate power, where individuals become mere numbers and their freedom is stripped away. This role is upheld as she manipulates situations to her favor, rationalizing her actions as beneficial. Not only does she depict the threats posed by authoritative figures in the corporate world, but she also challenges the protagonist to confront the ethical implications of his choices, firmly establishing her as a linchpin in the narrative.

Symbolic Role: Represents the oppressive nature of corporate control and the loss of individuality.

Suggestions

Explore potential layers of sympathy or justification for her methods.
Suggest scenarios where her intentions could be misinterpreted to deepen complexity.

Follow-up Questions

How can Cobel's role as an antagonist be used to highlight themes of freedom and individuality?
What might it take for the audience to empathize with Cobel?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 9

Cobel’s personal journey and embodying of corporate ideology thread powerfully through the screenplay’s themes, such as the tension between individual freedom and systemic control. Her manipulation and enforcement of the severance process pose critical questions about identity, choice, and the nature of happiness. As she interacts with Mark, the implications of severance are magnified, resonating with the thematic undercurrents of the story and forcing the audience to grapple with conflicting beliefs surrounding autonomy and conformity.

Suggestions

Connect her motivations to larger thematic discussions within the script.
Expose conflicting viewpoints, illustrating her character as a necessary element in the thematic framework.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cobel’s character challenge or reinforce the themes presented in the narrative?
What are the implications of her actions on the overall message of the screenplay?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Cobel effectively elicits strong emotional responses, primarily rooted in tension, unease, and moral questioning. Her calculated remarks and authoritative presence leave the audience feeling apprehensive about how far she will go, which fosters a sense of excitement and fear. Furthermore, the emotional dissonance between her polished exterior and cruel underlying motivations leads to significant dramatic tension, making her character pivotal in engaging viewers throughout the story.

Emotional Impact: Evokes tension and moral conflict in the audience.

Suggestions

Incorporate more reflective moments where her actions may backfire to deepen emotional complexity.
Introduce scenarios that elicit pity or deeper emotional conflict.

Follow-up Questions

What emotional responses should Cobel evoke to strengthen her role?
How are her actions perceived differently by various characters?

Personality Types

MBTI: entj

Cobel exhibits traits common to ENTJs, such as assertiveness, strategic thinking, and a focus on efficiency and leadership, particularly in her role overseeing the severance process.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: intj (15%)

Suggestions

Explore more emotional layers to balance her directive nature.
Present moments showing her strategic thinking process.

Follow-up Questions

What motivates her strategic decisions beyond mere efficiency?
In what situations does her assertiveness falter?

Enneagram: type 8 - the challenger

Cobel demonstrates strong challenger traits, characterized by her need for control, assertive nature, and willingness to challenge anyone who opposes her beliefs.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: type 3 - the achiever (25%)

Suggestions

Show how her control might stem from insecurity regarding her position.
Explore the pressures she faces to achieve her goals.

Follow-up Questions

How does her challenger nature affect her relationships with others?
What vulnerabilities might she mask under her assertive exterior?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (39)

Cobel's confrontation with Mark about his emotional state stands out.

Why: This scene highlights her calm menace and duality, effectively showcasing her manipulative nature.

Weakest Scene (0)

Cobel's introduction during Mark's orientation lacks depth.

Why: This scene could further explore her motivations beyond procedural authority.

Suggestions:

Incorporate insights into her past during this scene to make her motives clearer.
Add dialogue that hints at her personal stakes in the severance process.

Irving - Score: 66/100

Role

Supporting Character

Personality

MBTI: INFP
Enneagram: Type 9 - The Peacemaker

Scenes

Strongest: #4

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 7/10

Irving embodies innocence amidst corporate oppression.

Complexity And Depth 6/10

Irving grapples with the oppressive nature of his work.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 5/10

Irving's character appears to maintain a consistent demeanor despite the evolving chaos around him.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Irving's dialogues reflect his innocence and comedic relief.

Behavior And Choices 6/10

Irving exhibits a mix of compliance and naivety.

Relationship Dynamics 7/10

Irving shares a supportive relationship with colleagues, particularly Helly.

Scene Impact 6/10

Irving serves as an anchor amidst chaotic scenes.

Role Fulfillment 7/10

Irving is a comedic foil, enhancing the narrative's thematic depth.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Irving embodies the themes of isolation and absurdity.

Emotional Resonance 7/10

Evokes sympathy through innocence and humor.

Foundational Definition

Score: 7

Irving Bailiff is portrayed as an older, heavyset man with a childlike demeanor, showcasing a mix of innocence and confusion within the ominous corporate environment. His foundational traits suggest a vulnerability to the oppressive atmosphere of the workplace, coupled with a childlike innocence that both disarms and endears him to others. This makes him a grounding presence within the team, highlighting the bizarre and often dark atmosphere of the office. He is depicted with a sense of nostalgia and a desire for connection, illustrated through his interactions with Helly and his reluctance to embrace the harsh realities of their work.

Values And Beliefs: Connection with colleagues, A desire to feel valued, Simplicity in a complex world

Strengths And Skills: Emotional resilience, Ability to bring humor into stressful situations, Strong data culling skills

Suggestions

Develop his backstory to explore why he is so optimistic in a grim workplace.
Show more interaction with the other colleagues to flesh out his relationships.

Follow-up Questions

What events in Irving's past contribute to his childlike outlook on life?
How does Irving's demeanor affect team morale during high-stress situations?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 6

Irving's internal conflict stems from his awareness of the oddities of their situation contrasted with his cheerful demeanor. His childlike qualities mask a deeper understanding of their dark reality, creating an emotional wound around his longing for genuine connection and stability. His struggle with the oppressive nature of his job may reflect his own fears of abandonment or insignificance.

Character Wound: Longing for connection in a disjointed world

Character Flaws: Childlike naivety, Tendency to avoid confronting difficult truths

Suggestions

Introduce moments where Irving's naivety leads to conflict.
Explore his inner thoughts to reveal the dichotomy between his innocence and the harsh reality.

Follow-up Questions

What does Irving fear losing by not confronting the truth of their situation?
How might his optimism help or hinder his ability to grow within the story?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 5

Throughout the screenplay, Irving remains a static character, serving as a foil to the other more dynamic characters. His consistency offers a strange comfort amidst the chaos, but it also emphasizes his lack of growth or change in response to the events happening around him. His path seems to illustrate the dangers of complacency in dire situations.

Suggestions

Introduce a pivotal moment that forces Irving to confront the reality of their situation.
Consider giving him a moment of bravery or clarity to elevate his role within the office.

Follow-up Questions

What would push Irving to confront his naivety or complacency?
How does his lack of growth affect the team dynamic in critical moments?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Irving often speaks in a straightforward, earnest manner, relying on humor and simplicity to connect with his colleagues. His dialogue is characterized by phrases that highlight his innocence and earnest nature, which contrasts sharply with the darker themes of the series. This choice builds an endearing quality but also underscores the tragic absurdity of their environment.

Unique Voice: Childlike humor mixed with sincerity.

Suggestions

Add more quips that reflect Irving's childlike perspective but tie them to the broader themes.
Use his voice to introduce lighter moments amidst darker scenes to reinforce his role as comic relief.

Follow-up Questions

How can Irving's dialogue reflect a deeper understanding of their situation?
What specific lines could be used to illustrate his innocence amidst the chaos?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 6

Irving's actions often reflect his desire to maintain a sense of normalcy and connection. However, this comes into conflict with the oppressive nature of their workplace. His choices, such as avoiding conflict and engaging in lighthearted banter, reveal both his resilience and his ultimate unwillingness to confront the darker aspects of their reality.

Motivations: To feel valued and connected to his colleagues.

Desires Vs Needs: Irving desires camaraderie and acceptance while needing to confront the harsh truths of their workplace.

Suggestions

Create scenarios that test Irving's ability to stand up for his beliefs.
Highlight moments where Irving’s choices impact the team dynamic.

Follow-up Questions

What choices does Irving make that show resilience against the workplace's bleak atmosphere?
How do his decisions impact the overall narrative arc of the team?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 7

Irving's relationships, especially with Helly and Dylan, showcase his nurturing nature. He often acts as a mediator, providing comic relief while underscoring the emotional weight of their situation. These dynamics create a sense of camaraderie among the characters, allowing for accessible emotional beats amidst the story's tension.

Suggestions

Deepen Irving’s interactions with Helly to explore their camaraderie further.
Introduce conflicts that test his relationships, prompting growth.

Follow-up Questions

How do Irving's relationships with his colleagues evolve throughout the series?
What do these dynamics reveal about his true character beneath the humor?

Scene Impact

Score: 6

Irving's presence fluctuates between comedic and sincere, grounding scenes with humor while also reflecting the seriousness of their situation. His reactions often provide a foil against the other team members, revealing different facets of their personalities and the overall narrative tension.

Suggestions

Leverage Irving's humor to juxtapose darker scenes, providing a more complex emotional tapestry.
Have him play a crucial role in resolving conflicts in key scenes.

Follow-up Questions

In what scenes does Irving have the most significant emotional or narrative impact?
How does his presence in tense moments alter the tone of those scenes?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 7

Irving fulfills the role of the naive observer who provides comic relief, yet his backstory and demeanor reveal the heartbreaking nature of their workplace. His interactions and innocence symbolize the loss of genuine human interaction amidst the cold, corporate machine they serve. His consistent presence encourages audiences to empathize with the impact of their work environment.

Symbolic Role: Represents innocence and the loss of genuine connection in a corporate environment.

Suggestions

Underscore Irving's innocence with moments that challenge his perspective.
Consider scenarios where he becomes an unexpected source of wisdom or clarity.

Follow-up Questions

How does Irving's role contribute to the overall themes of isolation and humanity in the story?
What moments could he have that redefine his narrative function?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Irving's character journey intertwined with the central theme of severance embodies the conflict between personal connection and corporate isolation. His innocence and humor highlight the daily absurdity the employees face, contrasting the serious implications of the severance procedure. Irving helps paint a richer picture of the emotional consequences of a severed identity and its impacts on human interaction.

Suggestions

Enhance his engagement with themes of connection versus isolation.
Create moments that emphasize his role as a commentary on workplace absurdity.

Follow-up Questions

What key moments best illustrate how Irving contributes to the narrative’s themes?
How can Irving's interactions further highlight the effects of severance on personal relationships?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 7

Irving's character tends to elicit feelings of empathy from the audience through his innocence and humorous yet poignant demeanor. His actions and choices reflect an emotional landscape that audiences can connect with, amplifying the tension of the situations he finds himself in. The juxtaposition of humor and the dire implications of the severance procedure create a richer emotional experience.

Emotional Impact: Evokes sympathy and warmth contrasted with underlying sadness.

Suggestions

Add depth to his character to enhance audience empathy.
Incorporate opportunities for moments of vulnerability that strengthen emotional connections.

Follow-up Questions

What moments evoke the strongest emotional reaction from the audience?
How can Irving's character be used to challenge or deepen audience sentiments about the storyline?

Personality Types

MBTI: infp

Irving's idealistic nature, coupled with his sensitivity and warmth, aligns with INFP traits. He often shows strong emotions and a desire for connection, reflecting the depth of the character.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: isfp (55%)

Suggestions

Utilize the emotional depth of the INFP type to enhance Irving’s connections with others.
Consider incorporating more artistry or creativity into his characterization.

Follow-up Questions

How does his INFP nature influence his interactions within the team?
What specific situations challenge his typical responses as an INFP?

Enneagram: type 9 - the peacemaker

Irving’s desire for connection and avoidance of conflict resonates with Type 9 traits, showcasing his tendencies to keep harmony among his colleagues while often disregarding his needs.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: type 6 - the loyalist (60%)

Suggestions

Explore conflicts that challenge Irving's peacekeeping nature.
Introduce moments that test his loyalty to the team versus individual truths.

Follow-up Questions

In what situations does Irving exemplify his peacemaker tendencies?
How can his character be further shaped by his loyalty to the group versus personal truths?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (4)

Irving's playful interaction with Helly in the Culling Office where he arranges objects and joins in on light banter despite the tense environment.

Why: This scene showcases his ability to maintain a lighthearted spirit amidst darkness, effectively grounding the narrative.

Weakest Scene (0)

none

Why: none

Suggestions:

none

Helly - Score: 73/100

Role

Protagonist

Personality

MBTI: ENTP
Enneagram: Type 7 - The Enthusiast

Scenes

Strongest: #1

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Independent with a rebellious spirit shaped by experience.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

Struggles with identity and emotional wounds stemming from being trapped.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 6/10

Helly shows signs of struggling against her situation, indicating potential growth.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Witty, sharp dialogue reflecting her independent nature.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Motivated by a need for freedom and self-identity.

Relationship Dynamics 7/10

Complex relationships driven by mutual struggle.

Scene Impact 8/10

Helly's presence introduces conflict and highlights the absurdity.

Role Fulfillment 7/10

Capably reflects the fight against conformity.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Integral to themes of autonomy and corporate control.

Emotional Resonance 7/10

Evokes strong feelings of empathy and frustration.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Helly is introduced as a young woman who is small but fiercely independent, with a determined spirit. Despite her petite appearance, she exhibits a strength of character that allows her to navigate the oppressive work environment confidently. Her quick wit and sense of humor serve as tools for coping with the surreal and daunting circumstances she finds herself in, highlighting her resilience. She has already been in the environment for three years, indicating that she has experience within the system, yet retains a sense of rebellion against the norms.

Values And Beliefs: Independence, resilience, questioning authority.

Strengths And Skills: Adaptability, quick thinking, humor.

Suggestions

Explore Helly's backstory to provide insight into her determination.
Develop scenes that showcase her skill in navigating corporate skepticism.

Follow-up Questions

What specific events from her past led to her strong sense of independence?
How has her resilience been tested over the years in this environment?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Helly's internal conflict stems from her struggle with memory and identity in a place where her past is continuously separated from her present. Despite having been in the culling office for three years, she expresses a desire for clarity about the outside world and how it intersects with her current existence. This indicates a deep emotional wound related to self-identity and the feeling of being trapped, contributing to her seeming restlessness and impulsive actions.

Character Wound: Loss of identity and autonomy.

Character Flaws: Impulsiveness, occasional emotional volatility.

Suggestions

Provide deeper insights into how her emotional wounds affect her decision-making.
Include moments that expose her vulnerabilities in high-pressure situations.

Follow-up Questions

How does Helly cope with the emotional turmoil of her situation?
What triggers her impulsive actions, and how can they be explored further?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 6

As the story progresses, Helly's journey illustrates a fluctuating dynamic between compliance and rebellion. Initially portrayed as part of the culling team, she gradually becomes more vocal about her dissatisfaction with their circumstances and the overarching corporate structure. Her interactions with Mark act as catalysts for her personal growth, causing her to evaluate her choices and the nature of her imprisonment.

Polarity Changes: Initial compliance turning into defiance.

Transformation Triggers: Meeting Mark and recognizing their shared struggles.

Suggestions

Amplify key moments where Helly expresses her desires for freedom.
Show her reactions to events that push her towards self-discovery.

Follow-up Questions

What specific events will act as pivotal moments for her transformation?
How will her relationship with Mark influence her character arc?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Helly’s dialogue is laced with humor and sarcasm, which reveals her intelligence and her method of coping with the absurdity of her situation. Her ability to articulate her thoughts candidly often highlights the contrast between her outward demeanor and her internal emotional struggles. As she interacts with Mark and others, her speech provides insight into her rebellious spirit.

Unique Voice: Quick-witted banter, defiance against authority.

Suggestions

Include more instances where her humor helps diffuse tension.
Use her dialogue to reveal deeper layers of her emotional state.

Follow-up Questions

How can Helly's dialogue serve as a vehicle for revealing her vulnerabilities?
What conversations would provide insight into her internal conflict?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Helly's decisions flow from her acute awareness of her circumstances and her yearning to reclaim her autonomy. Particularly, her choice to help Mark and her willingness to question the established order showcase her desire to break free from the culling process. These choices highlight her internal struggle against the confines of her current role.

Motivations: Desire for freedom, understanding her identity.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires to escape versus the need for clarity about her situation.

Suggestions

Illustrate more moments that define her courageous choices.
Create scenarios that challenge her motivations and force confrontation.

Follow-up Questions

What events will encapsulate her decisions to either conform or rebel?
How will her choices impact her relationships with others in the office?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 7

Helly's interactions with her colleagues reveal her mounting frustration with the system and her deeper connections with figures like Mark, showcasing her desire for camaraderie and understanding. The dynamics emphasize the isolation within the corporate culture, contrasted with her moments of alliance and partnership.

Suggestions

Flesh out Helly's relationships with her other colleagues.
Show instances where emotional connections deepen or fracture.

Follow-up Questions

How do her relationships evolve as tensions rise within the office?
What pivotal interactions will shape her bond with Mark?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

Helly's scenes are often charged with tension as her actions and words challenge the status quo. Her quick decisions, like supporting Mark or taking a stand against the corporate structure, add complexity to the narrative and propel the story forward. She acts as a catalyst for both conflict and potential resolution.

Suggestions

Focus on her moments that shift the tone of scenes drastically.
Maximize her presence in scenes to enhance the emotional stakes.

Follow-up Questions

What scenes would best showcase her impact on the storyline?
How does she contribute to the evolving dynamics in pivotal moments?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 7

Helly embodies the theme of resistance within a corporate space designed for conformity. Her actions and words demonstrate the struggle of individuals seeking deeper truths about themselves and their society. As she champions both her rights and those of her colleagues, she serves as a critical driving force in the narrative.

Symbolic Role: Represents rebellion against oppressive systems.

Suggestions

Clearly define her role in moments of rebellion.
Highlight her symbolic significance throughout the plot.

Follow-up Questions

How does her role reflect larger societal issues in the narrative?
What instances can augment her position as an agent of change?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Helly's journey serves as a microcosm for the greater conflict between personal freedom and corporate identity. Her quest for self-understanding and reclamation of agency entwines seamlessly with the screenplay's larger themes, amplifying the narrative's emotional depth and complexity.

Suggestions

Show her struggles paralleled with broader themes in the story.
Integrate her choices with the thematic evolution of the plot.

Follow-up Questions

What specific themes resonate most with Helly's experiences?
How can her journey highlight the tension between individuality and conformity?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 7

Helly's depiction evokes a strong emotional response, as her struggles reflect the intrinsic human desire for connection and self-definition. Her moments of vulnerability and defiance resonate deeply, engaging the audience and prompting reflection on their own experiences within systematic environments.

Emotional Impact: Creates empathy and tension as audiences feel her frustrations.

Suggestions

Enhance her emotional beats through reflective dialogue.
Incorporate moments that show her raw emotional states more clearly.

Follow-up Questions

What aspects of her journey can deepen audience engagement?
How can vulnerability be balanced with resilience in her portrayal?

Personality Types

MBTI: entp

Helly's quick wit, adaptability, and ability to challenge established norms indicate a preference for extroverted intuition and thinking. She displays the typical traits of an ENTP, being inventive and skeptical of the status quo.

Confidence: 75%

Suggestions

Utilize her ENTP traits to enhance her interaction with other characters.
Show her challenge accepted beliefs through innovative strategies.

Follow-up Questions

What specific ENTP traits can be highlighted in her character development?
How can her instinctual skepticism be portrayed in her dialogues?

Enneagram: type 7 - the enthusiast

Helly embodies a type 7 personality through her desire for fun, new experiences, and a resistance to being confined. Her rebellious spirit and quest for autonomy reflect the typical enthusiasm and quest for engagement associated with this type.

Confidence: 80%

Suggestions

Flesh out her moments of spontaneity to match the Type 7 spirit.
Indicate her struggles against constraints to emphasize her core motivations.

Follow-up Questions

How does Helly's Type 7 nature influence her choices?
What situations can exacerbate her fears of being trapped or limited?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (1)

Helly's interaction in the stairwell with Mark exhibits her wit and immediate connection with him.

Why: This scene showcases both her cleverness and sets the tone for their alliance, establishing her as a strong, engaging character in direct contravention to the oppressive nature of their situation.

Weakest Scene (0)

none

Why: none

Harmony - Score: 78/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ENTJ
Enneagram: 3 (The Achiever)

Scenes

Strongest: #13

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Calm yet sinister manager of the organization.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

A complex character with manipulative tendencies and potential emotional wounds.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 6/10

A character that remains largely stagnant in her antagonistic role, exerting control over others.

Dialogue And Voice 8/10

Cobel's dialogue reflects a strategic and calculated speech style.

Behavior And Choices 7/10

Cold, calculated behavior driven by a desire for control and adherence to company philosophy.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Cobel's relationships are characterized by manipulation and hierarchy.

Scene Impact 9/10

Cobel’s presence introduces tension and moral ambiguity to key scenes.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

Cobel fulfills the role of the corporate antagonist.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Cobel embodies the themes of control and isolation prevalent in the narrative.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Elicits unease and tension through her manipulative demeanor.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Harmony Cobel serves as an unsettling manager at the organization where Mark finds himself trapped. Her demeanor is calm and collected, but she harbors a sinister edge, suggesting a background in manipulation and control. Cobel embodies the cold efficiency of the company and represents its morally ambiguous practices, shaping a worldview that values conformity and obedience over individual autonomy.

Values And Beliefs: Efficiency, control, secrecy, and detachment from personal emotions.

Strengths And Skills: Manipulation, persuasive communication, and an ability to maintain calm under pressure.

Suggestions

Explore her backstory further to understand her motivations and past experiences.
Reveal moments of vulnerability to add depth and complexity.

Follow-up Questions

What drove Harmony to accept a role that requires such detachment from others' emotions?
How does her upbringing influence her current behavior and values?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Cobel's complex nature is highlighted through her interactions with Mark, particularly her manipulative tactics when she offers him a job. This juxtaposition of personal charm and professional coldness suggests an internal conflict rooted in her own fears and the pressure to uphold the company’s oppressive practices. Her emotional wounds could stem from a desire for power and control in a world that feels chaotic.

Character Wound: Fear of losing control or being vulnerable.

Character Flaws: Manipulative, emotionally detached, and overly controlling.

Suggestions

Add scenes that reveal her motivations behind the strict corporate culture.
Incorporate backstory elements that hint at personal loss or failure.

Follow-up Questions

What does Harmony truly desire beyond her role in the company?
How might her insecurities manifest in her relationships with others?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 6

Throughout the story, Harmony does not exhibit significant growth or transformation. Instead, she embodies the principles of the organization, illustrating a clear resistance to change and a commitment to maintaining her position of power. This lack of evolution highlights her role as a symbol of the corporate machine.

Polarity Changes: None evident; maintains controlling nature throughout.

Transformation Triggers: None explicitly mentioned; she seems to reinforce the status quo.

Suggestions

Consider scenarios that might challenge her views and force her to evolve.
Introduce interpersonal conflicts that could lead to an internal struggle.

Follow-up Questions

What could prompt Harmony to reconsider her approach to leadership?
How does her lack of development impact her relationships with coworkers?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 8

Harmony’s dialogue often conveys authority while dripping with subtext. She uses manipulation cloaked in conversational language to disarm her subjects, showcasing her skill in navigating power dynamics smoothly. This allows her to maintain control and assert influence over others while appearing friendly.

Unique Voice: A mix of formal and casual tones with underlying menace.

Suggestions

Diversify her dialogue with moments of emotional vulnerability to create contrast.
Explore varied speech patterns that hint at her emotional state.

Follow-up Questions

How do her words impact Mark's perception of her throughout the series?
What does her choice of language reveal about her feelings toward her job?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 7

Cobel's behavior displays a clear tendency to manipulate situations to suit her needs. Her choices reflect adherence to the company's ethos while highlighting her own need for power and influence within that structure. Her insistence on confidentiality and her bizarre rituals reveal her commitment to the organization’s operant conditioning techniques.

Motivations: To maintain order within the company and support its ethical standpoints.

Desires Vs Needs: Externally desires control and authority; internally needs validation and acceptance.

Suggestions

Add more conflict-driven decisions that shed light on her ethical boundaries.
Create situations where her motivations directly clash with personal relationships.

Follow-up Questions

What ethical lines is she willing to cross to maintain her authority?
How do her choices impact the other characters in personal ways?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

Harmony's dynamics with others, particularly Mark, are steeped in manipulation. She operates as both mentor and antagonist, guiding him while simultaneously orchestrating his subjugation. This duality enhances the tension in their interactions and presents her as a formidable presence that evokes both curiosity and fear.

Suggestions

Deepen her connections with characters to showcase her emotional range.
Incorporate moments where she is challenged in her relationships.

Follow-up Questions

What does her relationship with Mark reveal about her leadership style?
How do her interactions with other employees reflect her overall character?

Scene Impact

Score: 9

Any scene featuring Harmony is charged with tension and serves to deepen the unsettling atmosphere of the organizational environment. Her actions and decisions create pivotal moments that drive the plot forward and catalyze character arcs, particularly in relation to Mark’s journey.

Suggestions

Maximize her impact by making strategic choices or reversals during critical scenes.
Explore her level of control in moments where power dynamics shift.

Follow-up Questions

How does her presence shape the protagonist's motivations?
What elements can be added to amplify her tension in key moments?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

As a corporate manager, Harmony symbolizes the organization’s oppressive ideals. Her character is essential in the narrative, accentuating themes of control and dehumanization, standing as both Mark’s challenger and the embodiment of the system’s moral failings.

Symbolic Role: Represents the bureaucratic machine and oppressive control.

Suggestions

Strengthen her role by allowing moments of vulnerability that challenge typical antagonist tropes.
Subvert expectations through powerful scene interactions.

Follow-up Questions

How does Harmony’s role reflect broader societal issues within corporate structures?
In what ways can her character potentially evolve to either align or conflict with Mark's journey?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Her character integrates themes of control, manipulation, and the consequences of corporate anonymity. Cobel’s actions and beliefs drive much of the plot, particularly in how they illuminate the conflict between personal freedom and corporate power.

Suggestions

Interweave moments that showcase the effects of her beliefs on her mental state.
Embed thematic elements even further into her interactions with the protagonist.

Follow-up Questions

What broader themes can her actions reinforce throughout the storyline?
In what ways might her character challenge or align with central thematic ideas?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Cobel effectively creates discomfort and manipulation through her interactions with Mark, inviting the audience to feel his emotional turmoil. Her ability to disarm while simultaneously governing leads to a complex emotional landscape that resonates deeply.

Emotional Impact: Elicits unease and tension within the audience.

Suggestions

Heighten her emotional layers to deepen audience connection.
Introduce reactions from others in scenes to reflect her psychological impact.

Follow-up Questions

How does her emotional manipulation enhance the tension in scenes?
What elements can be added to increase audience sympathy or disdain?

Personality Types

MBTI: entj

Cobel exhibits traits of a natural leader, focusing on efficiency and strategic thinking.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: intj (70%)

Suggestions

Utilize MBTI traits to explore her strategic decision-making process.
Examine how her approach might clash with more empathetic characters.

Follow-up Questions

How do her personality traits influence her interaction style?
In what scenarios do her weaknesses as an ENTJ manifest?

Enneagram: 3 (the achiever)

Cobel appears highly driven by success and the approval of the corporate structure.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: 8 (the challenger) (70%)

Suggestions

Explore her motivations as an Enneagram 3 to develop depth.
Integrate moments where her drive for success may lead to conflict.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cobel’s achiever nature impact her relationships?
What fears might lie beneath her need for success?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (13)

Cobel's interaction with Mark in the basement highlights her manipulative nature and command.

Why: This scene effectively showcases her character dynamics and complexities.

Weakest Scene (0)

Cobel's presence during Mark's disorienting orientation lacks emotional engagement.

Why: This scene could benefit from a balance of control and compassion, reflecting her depth.

Suggestions:

Include dialogue that hints at her motivations beyond corporate loyalty.
Add non-verbal cues that align with her internal conflicts.

Milchick - Score: 71/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ESTJ
Enneagram: One

Scenes

Strongest: #1
Weakest: #4

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 7/10

PR facilitator with an insincere demeanor.

Complexity And Depth 6/10

Superficially confident but possibly insecure.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 5/10

Milchick remains consistent throughout the first episode.

Dialogue And Voice 8/10

Milchick's speech is overly polished, conveying a lack of authenticity.

Behavior And Choices 7/10

Milchick acts as a gatekeeper, enforcing the company's policies.

Relationship Dynamics 7/10

Milchick serves as a dissonant ally to Mark, complicating their interactions.

Scene Impact 8/10

Milchick is central to introducing tension during the orientation scenes.

Role Fulfillment 8/10

Milchick fulfills the role of an antagonist in Mark's journey.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Milchick embodies key themes of control and corporate identity loss.

Emotional Resonance 7/10

Elicits discomfort and skepticism from the audience.

Foundational Definition

Score: 7

Milchick serves as the PR facilitator during Mark's orientation in the corporate environment. His role is to present a friendly exterior that masks the underlying oppressive nature of the organization. Milchick’s demeanor suggests he values order and control, exhibiting enthusiasm for his job that feels insincere in the context of Mark's disorientation. His use of overly polite language despite the tense circumstances emphasizes a disconnect between company culture and the psychological effects of their operations on individuals like Mark.

Values And Beliefs: Order, Control, Professionalism

Strengths And Skills: Charismatic communication, Manipulation, Crisis management

Suggestions

Explore Milchick's backstory to deepen understanding of his motivations.
Add moments of vulnerability or doubt to create a richer character arc.

Follow-up Questions

What personal experiences have shaped Milchick's willingness to participate in ethically dubious practices?
How could Milchick's motivations be tied to a larger narrative theme of corporate disconnection?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 6

Though Milchick appears confident and upbeat, he may conceal underlying insecurities or ethical dilemmas about his job. These complexities could reveal a fear of failure or a need for approval from the corporate higher-ups, leading to his overcompensation through enthusiastic behavior. His interactions imply a strict adherence to authority, which could stem from a traumatic experience that instilled a belief that success is directly linked to obedience.

Character Wound: Fear of failure or reprimand from authority figures.

Character Flaws: Overly compliant, Manipulative, Lacks genuine empathy

Suggestions

Introduce flashbacks that hint at his past decisions that led him to this role.
Create instances where his mask slips, revealing his true feelings about the company.

Follow-up Questions

What past experiences have made Milchick prioritize corporate loyalty over personal ethics?
In what ways could his character serve as a mirror for Mark's struggles?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 5

Throughout the episode, Milchick maintains a seemingly unshakeable persona, embodying the company's values of professionalism and order. However, his reaction to Mark's breakdown hints at a possible internal conflict about the job he performs. His purpose within the plot remains largely static, serving more as a foil to Mark than undergoing any significant transformation himself.

Polarity Changes: None noted in this episode.

Transformation Triggers: The pressure of facilitating Mark's orientation amidst his apparent confusion.

Suggestions

Incorporate moments where Milchick second-guesses the repercussions of his actions.
Reveal information that could disrupt his sense of security in the workplace, prompting growth.

Follow-up Questions

What events could challenge Milchick's perception of his role within the company?
How does Milchick view the concept of 'severance,' and could that change?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 8

Milchick's dialogue often features corporate jargon and rehearsed phrases, emphasizing his role as a representative of the company rather than an individual with personal stakes. He speaks with an upbeat tone that contrasts with the discomfort of his surroundings, making his words feel insincere and calculated. This dissonance creates a notable tension between his intention to comfort and the reality of the company's practices.

Unique Voice: Overly formal and scripted, lacking emotional depth.

Suggestions

Add spontaneous dialogue that gives insight into his personal thoughts or fears.
Introduce colloquial language in moments of stress to humanize him.

Follow-up Questions

How could Milchick's language evolve in response to Mark's reactions?
What underlying truths about the company can be hinted at through his dialogue?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 7

Milchick's choices, such as how he addresses Mark and his insistence on adherence to protocol, showcase his primary motivation: to uphold the company’s standards. His repeated insistence on a non-existent casualness reveals a deeper compulsion to control the narrative surrounding their corporate practices. Through his behavior, he embodies the corporation's chilling efficiency and the lengths to which he goes to preserve it.

Motivations: Maintaining the company image and ensuring compliance.

Desires Vs Needs: Wants to appear competent; needs validation from superiors.

Suggestions

Show more internal conflict regarding the ethical ramifications of his role.
Include choices that reveal personal stakes tied to his job performance.

Follow-up Questions

What does Milchick stand to lose if Mark questions the company's processes?
In what ways do his choices reflect a broader critique of corporate culture?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 7

Milchick's interactions with Mark reveal a complex dynamic filled with subtle power plays. On the surface, he positions himself as a mentor during orientation, but his ultimate loyalties lie with the corporate structure rather than Mark's well-being. This creates a layered relationship marked by tension, manipulation, and a facade of friendliness. His dismissal of Mark's confusion and continuous push for compliance reflect a concerning disinterest in Mark's humanity.

Suggestions

Introduce scenes that explore Milchick's personal life, highlighting the contrast with his professional persona.
Define his relationships with colleagues to illustrate his position within the company's hierarchy.

Follow-up Questions

How does his relationship with Cobel shape his treatment of Mark?
Are there moments when Milchick's allegiance is challenged by Mark's behavior?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

In scenes where Milchick is present, he effectively crafts a sense of discomfort and rising stakes. His insistence on proceeding with the orientational survey despite Mark's evident distress highlights the chilling nature of corporate bureaucracy. Milchick’s interactions force the audience to feel the unease of being trapped in an environment designed to strip individuals of their agency, emphasizing both his character's impact and the systemic issues within the organization.

Suggestions

Heighten scenes' emotional stakes by adding more of Milchick's internal reactions.
Make his decisions more visibly affect the scene's outcome, enhancing overall tension.

Follow-up Questions

How does Milchick's presence alter the atmosphere in scenes he dominates?
What is the aesthetic of scenes that best portray his authoritative role?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 8

Milchick functions as an antagonist by embodying the dispassionate nature of the corporate world, one that prioritizes procedures over people. His polished demeanor contrasts sharply with the eerie atmosphere of the organization, making him a symbolic representation of the hidden mental toll the company takes on its employees. Milchick’s role amplifies the narrative’s themes of identity and autonomy, reinforcing the oppressive nature of the environment Mark has stumbled into.

Symbolic Role: Represents corporate deceit and manipulation.

Suggestions

Enhance the portrayal of his authority to make his opposition to Mark more palpable.
Explore contradictions between his professional image and personal insecurities.

Follow-up Questions

How does his role challenge Mark's understanding of freedom and choice?
What archetypal elements does Milchick represent, and how do they evolve?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Milchick's character arc is intricately tied to the exploration of autonomy versus corporate control. Through his actions and dialogue, he highlights the dehumanizing aspects of corporate culture, especially how systematic compliance can strip individuals of their identity. His interactions with Mark serve not only to push the plot forward but also deepen the thematic exploration of self versus collective identity and the psychological impacts of corporate environments.

Suggestions

Integrate themes of manipulation and choice more explicitly into his dialogue.
Create moments where he reflects on the nature of his work to enhance thematic engagement.

Follow-up Questions

What are the moral implications of Milchick's loyalty to the company regarding personal ethics?
How does the theme of identity loss resonate with Milchick’s own story?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 7

Milchick's actions and demeanor create a palpable tension that resonates with the audience, making them question the morality of corporate practices and the authenticity of human connection within that space. His unsettling politeness juxtaposed with the absurdity of the situation leads viewers to experience a mix of empathy for Mark and mistrust for Milchick. The emotional dissonance he creates is critical in shaping the audience's perceptions of the broader themes at play.

Emotional Impact: Milchick evokes discomfort and distrust among the audience.

Suggestions

Craft moments where Milchick’s façade nearly cracks to amplify emotional tension.
Include scenes that highlight the impact of his words on Mark to deepen audience engagement.

Follow-up Questions

How does Milchick's presence alter the viewer's perception of corporate culture?
What emotional responses do his actions elicit in Mark, and how are they reflected back to the audience?

Personality Types

MBTI: estj

Milchick displays traits typical of an ESTJ, such as being results-oriented, structured, and detail-focused. His assertiveness in managing the orientation process demonstrates a clear preference for organization and leadership.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: entj (60%)

Suggestions

Incorporate more spontaneous decision-making moments to explore his flexibility.
Show inner thoughts that contrast with his external persona to add depth.

Follow-up Questions

How do Milchick's personality traits affect his interaction with colleagues?
What internal conflicts might an ESTJ face when forced to follow unethical directives?

Enneagram: one

Milchick embodies the Enneagram One’s traits of being principled and perfectionistic, striving to maintain high standards and control his environment, indicating a strong sense of duty within his corporate role.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: three (55%)

Suggestions

Explore how his perfectionism might lead to errors or conflicts with others.
Recruit moments of self-reflection that demonstrate his moral compass at odds.

Follow-up Questions

How does his ethical framework influence his behavior and choices?
What might cause a Type One to question their rigid beliefs within this corporate structure?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (1)

Milchick's introduction during Mark's orientation sets a powerful tone and establishes conflict.

Why: This scene effectively conveys the corporate atmosphere and highlights his cold, insincere friendliness.

Weakest Scene (4)

Milchick’s attempt to persuade Mark to accept the orientation feels overly scripted and lacks tension.

Why: Without a sense of risk or conflict, the scene does not fully showcase his manipulative skills.

Suggestions:

Add obstacles that necessitate improvisation or reveal his discomfort.
Heighten the stakes for both characters to generate real tension.

Theme

Theme Details

Theme Explanation

Identity and Existence (25%)

Mark's struggle to understand his identity and purpose, the questioning of reality and perception, and the manipulation of memories.

The film explores themes of identity and existence through Mark's journey of self-discovery and the manipulation of his memories. The film raises questions about the nature of reality and perception, and the extent to which our identities are shaped by our experiences and memories.

Strengthening Identity and Existence:

Suggestion Type	How to Strengthen the Theme
Dialogue - Scene 1	Add a line to the Intercom Voice asking Mark why he was outside the Wellness Center, emphasizing the importance of following protocol and staying within designated areas.
Action - Scene 3	Have Mark hesitate before running out of the office, with a brief moment of contemplation or doubt that reflects his inner struggle over his identity and purpose.
Character Arc - Scene 4	Expand upon Irving's personal ritual of arranging objects under his desk to create a human face, highlighting the contrast between his childlike behavior and the dehumanizing environment of Lumon.
Visual - Scene 6	Visually emphasize the isolation and confusion Mark feels by having him wander through the endless expanse of cubicles without interacting with any other employees.
Story Arc - Scene 9	Introduce a subtle but significant clue during Mark's car accident to foreshadow his deeper connection to the events surrounding Lumon, such as a glimpse of a Lumon logo on a passing vehicle.

Control and Power (20%)

The power dynamics between Cobel, Milchick, and Mark, the surveillance and control of the organization, and the manipulation and exploitation of employees.

The film explores themes of control and power through the relationship between the characters and the organization. Cobel and Milchick represent the authority and control of the organization, while Mark represents the individual struggling against that control. The film depicts the manipulative and exploitative tactics used by the organization to maintain its power.

Isolation and Alienation (15%)

Mark's feelings of isolation and alienation, his disconnection from the outside world, and the lack of human connection within the organization.

The film explores themes of isolation and alienation through Mark's experiences. Mark is isolated from the outside world and feels disconnected from his colleagues. The film depicts the emotional and psychological toll that isolation and alienation can take on an individual.

Choice and Morality (15%)

Mark's decision to undergo the severance procedure, the ethical implications of the organization's practices, and the consequences of one's choices.

The film explores themes of choice and morality through Mark's decision to undergo the severance procedure. The film raises questions about the ethical implications of the organization's practices and the consequences of one's choices. Mark's decision has a profound impact on his life and the lives of those around him.

Existential Dread (10%)

Mark's existential angst and feelings of insignificance, the uncertainty and meaninglessness of life, and the fear of the unknown.

The film explores themes of existential dread through Mark's experiences. Mark grapples with existential angst and feelings of insignificance. The film depicts the fear and uncertainty that can accompany the contemplation of one's own existence and the meaning of life.

Grief and Loss (10%)

Mark's grief over the loss of his former life and relationships, the emotional toll of the severance procedure, and the impact of trauma on the human psyche.

The film explores themes of grief and loss through Mark's experiences. Mark grieves the loss of his former life and relationships. The film depicts the emotional toll that the severance procedure takes on Mark and the impact of trauma on the human psyche.

Duality and Paradox (5%)

The contrast between Mark's work and personal lives, the tension between his memories and his current existence, and the coexistence of opposing forces.

The film explores themes of duality and paradox through Mark's experiences. Mark's work and personal lives are in conflict, and he struggles to reconcile his memories with his current existence. The film depicts the tension and矛盾s that can arise when opposing forces coexist.

Screenwriting Resources on Themes

Articles

Site	Description
Studio Binder	Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters
Coverfly	Improving your Screenplay's theme
John August	Writing from Theme

YouTube Videos

Title	Description
Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics	Screenwriting basics - beginner video
What is theme	Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay.
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script	Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts

Goals and Philosophical Conflict
internal Goals	The protagonist's internal goal is to understand his situation and regain his memory, reflecting his fear and confusion in a chaotic environment
External Goals	The protagonist's external goal is to navigate the strange environment and potentially find a way out, reflecting the immediate challenges he faces
Philosophical Conflict	The overarching philosophical conflict is the clash between individual agency and institutional control, as the protagonist struggles to maintain his identity and autonomy in a manipulated environment.

Character Development Contribution: The goals and conflicts challenge the protagonist's beliefs about himself, identity, and autonomy, leading to a deeper exploration of his values and choices.

Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the protagonist's journey, creating tension and suspense as he navigates the unknown and confronts ethical dilemmas.

Thematic Depth Contribution: The exploration of autonomy, morality, and reality adds complexity and depth to the screenplay's themes, raising questions about identity, control, and ethics.

Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Articles

Site	Description
Creative Screenwriting	How Important Is A Character’s Goal?
Studio Binder	What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict

YouTube Videos

Title	Description
How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict	How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode.
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great	By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals	By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy?

What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \ It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.

Abbreviate Headers

Story Content

Character Development

Scene Elements

Audience Engagement

Technical Aspects

			Story Content			Character Development				Scene Elements					Audience Engagement				Technical Aspects
Click for Full Analysis	Tone	Overall	Concept	Plot	Originality	Characters	Character Changes	Internal Goal	External Goal	Conflict	Opposition	High stakes	Story forward	Twist	Emotional Impact	Dialogue	Engagement	Pacing	Formatting	Structure
1 - The Inqusition	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense	8	9	8	9	7	6	8	7	9	8	8	8	8	7	8	9	9	8	8
2 - Mark's Escape	Suspenseful, Intense, Confused, Serious	8	8	9	9	8	7	8	7	9	8	8	9	9	8	7	9	8	8	8
3 - Mark's Morning Misadventures	Mysterious, Suspenseful, Intriguing, Dark	8	9	8	9	8	8	8	7	7	8	7	8	9	7	9	9	8	8	8
4 - Irving's Secret Hobby	Mysterious, Intriguing, Suspenseful	8	8	7	9	8	6	8	7	6	7	6	8	8	7	9	9	8	8	8
5 - Mark's Initiation	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense, Intriguing	8	8	7	9	8	6	8	7	7	7	7	8	8	7	9	9	8	8	8
6 - The Restroom Encounter	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Dark, Humorous	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	6	7	6	8	8	6	8	9	8	8	8
7 - Mark's Storage Closet Ascent	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense	8	8	9	9	7	6	9	8	9	8	8	9	8	7	7	9	9	9	9
8 - Mark's Discovery	Mysterious, Tense, Confused, Intriguing	8	8	7	9	7	6	8	7	7	7	7	8	8	6	7	9	8	8	8
9 - Mark's Dilemma	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense, Melancholic	8	8	7	9	7	7	8	7	7	7	7	7	8	9	6	9	8	8	8
10 - The Cat Incident	Anxious, Confused, Regretful	8	8	7	9	8	8	9	8	7	7	7	7	7	9	7	9	8	8	8
11 - Death of Innocence	Tense, Mysterious, Confrontational	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	8	7	7	7	8	9	9	9	8	8	8
12 - The Pickle	Intense, Dark, Intriguing, Unsettling	9	9	8	9	9	8	9	8	7	8	7	8	9	9	9	9	8	8	8
13 - Severance Offer	Dark, Intense, Disturbing, Mysterious	9	9	8	9	8	8	9	8	9	8	9	8	9	9	7	9	8	8	8
14 - A Dismissed Claim	Intriguing, Suspenseful, Dark, Mysterious	8	8	7	9	8	6	8	7	7	7	6	8	8	7	7	9	8	8	8
15 - The Decision	Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense, Intriguing	9	9	8	9	8	7	8	7	8	7	9	9	8	9	7	9	8	8	8
16 - Confrontation in the Hallways	Mysterious, Dark, Intense, Surreal	9	9	8	9	8	7	8	7	8	7	8	8	8	7	8	9	8	8	8

Summary of Scene Level Analysis

Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.

Scene Strengths

Suspenseful atmosphere
Engaging plot
Engaging dialogue
Building tension and suspense
Rich character development

Scene Weaknesses

Some dialogue could be more impactful
Limited character development in this scene
Some elements of the plot may be confusing without context
Pacing may be slow for some viewers
Some may find the surreal elements confusing or distracting

Suggestions

Focus on creating impactful dialogue that reveals character motivations
Ensure consistent character development throughout the screenplay
Provide clear context for elements of the plot to avoid confusion for the audience
Pay attention to pacing and consider tightening slower parts of the screenplay
Clarify and simplify surreal elements for better audience comprehension

World Building

Physical environment: The world of the script is characterized by a mix of sterile, uncomfortable, and mysterious environments. The offices in which the characters work are depicted as bland and isolating, with fluorescent lighting, pastel prints, and beige walls. In contrast, the hallways and rooms in the mysterious organization are characterized by darkened halls, dimly lit rooms, sharp twists, and translucent glass cubicle walls, creating a sense of confinement and surveillance. The external settings, such as the suburban neighborhood, the video store, and the Victorian house, are more mundane and realistic, but they also contribute to the overall atmosphere of uncertainty and unease.
Culture: The culture depicted in the screenplay is one of bureaucracy, authoritarianism, and surveillance. The characters are controlled and monitored by a mysterious organization, and their actions are constantly being observed and evaluated. There is a sense of isolation and alienation among the characters, who are often unaware of the true nature of their work and the organization they are serving.
Society: The society depicted in the screenplay is highly structured and hierarchical. The characters are divided into different classes, with those in higher positions having more power and control over those below them. There is a sense of inequality and injustice, as the lower-class characters are often exploited and mistreated by those in power. The society is also characterized by a lack of transparency and accountability, as the organization that controls the characters' lives is secretive and unaccountable.
Technology: Technology plays a significant role in the screenplay. The offices and hallways are equipped with surveillance cameras, intercom systems, and other technological devices that are used to monitor and control the characters. The characters also use computers and other devices to perform their work, and these devices are often used as a means of communication and information gathering. The presence of technology in the screenplay contributes to the sense of isolation and alienation among the characters, as they are constantly being watched and monitored.
Characters influence: The world elements in the screenplay have a profound impact on the characters' experiences and actions. The sterile and uncomfortable office environment creates a sense of isolation and alienation among the characters, who are often unsure of their purpose and place in the organization. The mysterious and oppressive atmosphere of the hallways and rooms in the organization contributes to a sense of paranoia and distrust among the characters, who are constantly worried about being watched and monitored. The external settings, such as the suburban neighborhood, the video store, and the Victorian house, provide a sense of normalcy and familiarity, but they also serve to highlight the characters' isolation and alienation from the outside world.
Narrative contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the narrative by creating a sense of mystery and suspense. The sterile and uncomfortable office environment, the mysterious and oppressive atmosphere of the hallways and rooms in the organization, and the external settings, such as the suburban neighborhood, the video store, and the Victorian house, all contribute to a sense of uncertainty and unease that keeps the reader guessing about what will happen next. The world elements also contribute to the narrative by providing a context for the characters' actions. The sterile and uncomfortable office environment, for example, helps to explain why the characters are so isolated and alienated from each other. The mysterious and oppressive atmosphere of the hallways and rooms in the organization helps to explain why the characters are so paranoid and distrustful of each other. The external settings, such as the suburban neighborhood, the video store, and the Victorian house, provide a sense of normalcy and familiarity, but they also serve to highlight the characters' isolation and alienation from the outside world.
Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring themes of isolation, alienation, and control. The sterile and uncomfortable office environment, the mysterious and oppressive atmosphere of the hallways and rooms in the organization, and the external settings, such as the suburban neighborhood, the video store, and the Victorian house, all contribute to a sense of isolation and alienation among the characters. The surveillance cameras, intercom systems, and other technological devices that are used to monitor and control the characters contribute to a sense of control and oppression. The screenplay explores these themes through the characters' experiences and actions, and it raises questions about the nature of reality, identity, and free will.

Voice Analysis
Summary:	The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and witty dialogue, existential themes, and a blend of humor and mystery, creating a distinct and engaging tone.
Voice Contribution	The writer's voice contributes to the script by enhancing the mood and themes of each scene, adding depth to the characters and their interactions, and creating a sense of intrigue and uncertainty that keeps the audience engaged.
Best Representation Scene	Scene 12 -
Best Scene Explanation	This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases the blend of dark humor, surreal dialogue, and existential themes that define the script. The dialogue is sharp and witty, revealing the characters' inner thoughts and motivations, while the discussion of the job offer and the consequences of accepting it raises questions about morality, identity, and the nature of work.

Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:

Pattern	Explanation
Emotional Intensity and Scene Progress
Tense Scenes and Character Changes
Mystery and Intrigue
High Stakes and Plot Development
Tone Diversity

Writer's Craft Overall Analysis

The screenplay demonstrates strong writing craft, with engaging dialogue, well-developed characters, and a unique voice that sets it apart from other works in the genre. The writer effectively blends genres, creates memorable characters and plot twists, and explores complex themes with depth and nuance.

Key Improvement Areas

Dialogue

Several scenes highlighted the writer's skill in creating sharp, witty, and engaging dialogue. To further refine this skill, focusing on character voices and subtext, as well as practicing dialogue-heavy scenes, would be beneficial.

Plot Structure and Pacing

Some scenes effectively built tension and suspense, while others could benefit from exploring different narrative techniques and structures. Studying screenplays with strong pacing and structure, such as 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder, can provide valuable insights.

Character Development

The writer excels in creating well-defined and complex characters. To enhance this aspect, practicing writing scenes with conflicting emotions and motivations, as well as exploring different ethical dilemmas and moral conflicts, can deepen character development and plot complexity.

Suggestions

Type	Suggestion	Rationale
Screenplay	Read 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' by Charlie Kaufman	This screenplay showcases a masterful blend of complex characters, existential themes, and engaging dialogue, providing valuable insights for the writer's own storytelling.
Video	Watch 'Her' directed by Spike Jonze	This film explores similar themes and storytelling techniques as the writer's screenplay, offering inspiration for developing unique and original narratives.
Exercise	Practice writing scenes with non-linear structurePractice In SceneProv	Exploring different narrative formats can help the writer expand their storytelling skills and experiment with new ideas, enhancing the overall impact of their scenes.
Exercise	Write a scene with only dialogue, focusing on character dynamics and conflictPractice In SceneProv	By honing their skills in crafting sharp and engaging dialogue, the writer can enhance the impact of their scenes and develop more dynamic characters.
Exercise	Practice writing scenes with cryptic dialogue and mysterious settingPractice In SceneProv	Creating tension and intrigue in dialogue and setting is a key element of the writer's style. Practicing this skill will help refine their ability to build suspense and engage the audience.

Additional Notes: The writer's unique voice and ability to blend genres, create memorable characters, and explore complex themes are commendable. With continued practice, refinement, and exploration of different storytelling techniques and structures, the writer has the potential to create truly exceptional and thought-provoking screenplays.

Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay

Trope	Trope Details	Trope Explanation
Amnesia	Mark wakes up with no memory of his past life.	Amnesia is a common trope in storytelling where a character loses their memory, often leading to confusion and mystery. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Memento' where the protagonist suffers from short-term memory loss.
Dystopian Society	Mark finds himself in a strange, sterile office environment with mysterious rules and procedures.	Dystopian society is a trope where the setting of the story is characterized by oppression, control, and dehumanization. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Matrix' where humans are controlled by machines in a simulated reality.
Mind Control	Cobel uses a beacon to split Mark's memories between work and personal life.	Mind control is a trope where a character's thoughts, actions, or memories are manipulated by an external force. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Black Mirror' where technology is used to control people's minds.
Existential Crisis	Mark questions his identity, purpose, and choices throughout the screenplay.	Existential crisis is a trope where a character grapples with profound questions about the meaning of life, existence, and their place in the world. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Fight Club' where the protagonist struggles with his sense of self and purpose.
Corporate Conspiracy	Cobel and Milchick manipulate Mark into a job with hidden conditions and mind control devices.	Corporate conspiracy is a trope where powerful organizations or individuals engage in secret, unethical activities to achieve their goals. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Mr. Robot' where a corporation manipulates global events for profit.
Mystery Box	Mark encounters mysterious characters and situations that raise questions about his past and future.	Mystery box is a storytelling technique where elements of mystery and intrigue are introduced to captivate the audience and keep them guessing. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Lost' where characters are stranded on an island with many unanswered questions.
Character Arc	Mark undergoes a transformation from confusion and resistance to acceptance and agency.	Character arc is a narrative structure where a character experiences growth, change, and development throughout the story. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Shawshank Redemption' where the protagonist evolves from hopelessness to freedom.
Gaslighting	Cobel manipulates Mark's perception of reality and memory to control his behavior.	Gaslighting is a trope where a character is psychologically manipulated to doubt their own sanity, memory, or perception of reality. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Gaslight' where a husband tries to convince his wife that she is going insane.
Surrealism	Mark encounters bizarre and dreamlike scenarios, such as a never-ending storage closet and a basement with mind control devices.	Surrealism is a trope where the story includes elements of the subconscious, dreams, and the irrational to create a sense of disorientation and wonder. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' where memories are erased through a surreal procedure.
Paranoia	Mark becomes increasingly paranoid as he uncovers hidden agendas and manipulations by Cobel and Milchick.	Paranoia is a trope where a character experiences intense fear, suspicion, and distrust of others, often leading to irrational behavior. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Truman Show' where the protagonist becomes paranoid about the artificial world around him.

Memorable lines in the script:

Scene Number	Line
16	Mark: I'm never going to leave here.
10	MARK: What kind of monster am I? Who hits a cat and then drives off to interview for a job no sane person would even want?
2	Mark: I'm being held here. I'm being held against my will.
7	Woman: I want to see my baby!
6	Helly: Because you’re more likely to accept it once they’ve broken you some.

Some Loglines to consider:

Can Mark navigate the bizarre world of the sterile office and figure out how to escape?
Mark is forced to choose between fixing his broken life and sacrificing his memories.
Harmony Cobel offers Mark a glimpse into the darker side of the sterile office.
Mark must solve the task of turning green symbols blue to uncover the truth behind his captivity.
In the end, Mark must confront the horror of the sterile office and make a decision that will change his life forever.

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Mark - Score: 84/100

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Foundational Definition 9/10

Complexity And Depth 8/10

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 7/10

Dialogue And Voice 8/10

Behavior And Choices 9/10

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

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Cobel - Score: 82/100

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