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Corruption and violence come to light in 1950s Los Angeles as a group of characters navigate the city's dark underbelly.
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What sets 'L.A. Confidential' apart is its ability to intertwine multiple character arcs with a complex narrative that reflects the moral ambiguities of its time. The screenplay not only serves as a gripping crime story but also as a commentary on the nature of justice and the human condition, appealing to audiences who appreciate depth in storytelling alongside thrilling plot twists.
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Story Facts
Genres: Crime, Drama, Mystery, Thriller, Romance, Film-Noir, Action, Film Noir
Setting: Post-World War II, specifically the late 1940s to early 1950s, Los Angeles, California
Themes: Corruption and Power, Moral Ambiguity, The American Dream and its Disillusionment, The Power of Influence and Manipulation, Redemption and Second Chances
Conflict & Stakes: The primary conflicts revolve around the moral dilemmas faced by the LAPD officers as they navigate corruption, personal loyalties, and the pursuit of justice in a crime-ridden Los Angeles, with high stakes involving their lives and careers.
Mood: Tense and gritty, with moments of introspection and moral ambiguity.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The intertwining lives of LAPD officers and their struggles against corruption within their own ranks.
- Major Twist: The revelation of Dudley's deep involvement in organized crime and his manipulation of other characters.
- Distinctive Setting: The vibrant yet dangerous backdrop of postwar Los Angeles, capturing the essence of the era.
- Innovative Ideas: The screenplay's exploration of the duality of human nature and the moral complexities faced by law enforcement.
- Unique Characters: Complex characters like Bud White and Ed Exley, who embody the struggle between personal ethics and professional duties.
Comparable Scripts: L.A. Confidential, The Godfather, Chinatown, The Departed, The Wire, Se7en, American Gangster, The Nice Guys, Heat
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L.A. Confidential Synopsis
Synopsis
Set in the 1950s, 'L.A. Confidential' unfolds in a post-war Los Angeles, a city teeming with ambition, corruption, and crime. The story begins with a montage showcasing the glamorous yet gritty side of L.A., where the police department is struggling to maintain order amidst the chaos of organized crime led by notorious mobster Mickey Cohen. The narrative centers around three distinct LAPD officers: Ed Exley, a straight-laced and ambitious cop determined to uphold the law; Bud White, a tough and violent officer with a personal vendetta against domestic abusers; and Jack Vincennes, a celebrity cop who moonlights as a technical advisor for a popular TV show, 'Badge of Honor.'
The plot thickens when a brutal massacre occurs at a coffee shop known as the Nite Owl, leaving six dead. The incident draws the attention of the LAPD, and Exley sees it as an opportunity to prove himself. He is determined to solve the case and rise through the ranks, despite the resentment he faces from his colleagues. Meanwhile, Bud White, who has his own demons to confront, becomes embroiled in the investigation as he seeks to uncover the truth behind the violence that plagues the city.
As the investigation unfolds, the three officers' paths intertwine, revealing a web of corruption that runs deep within the LAPD. Exley discovers that the Nite Owl massacre is linked to a heroin deal gone wrong, involving not only the mob but also corrupt officers within the department. Bud, driven by his own sense of justice, begins to suspect that his partner, Stensland, who was killed in the massacre, was involved in something much larger than he realized.
The tension escalates as Exley and Bud confront their own moral dilemmas, navigating a world where the lines between right and wrong are blurred. They uncover a conspiracy that implicates high-ranking officials, including Captain Dudley Smith, who is revealed to be orchestrating much of the corruption in the department. The stakes rise when they realize that their lives are in danger, and they must rely on each other to bring the truth to light.
In a climactic showdown, Bud confronts Dudley, leading to a violent confrontation that exposes the depths of betrayal and corruption within the LAPD. The film culminates in a bittersweet resolution, where justice is served, but at a great personal cost to the characters involved. Exley emerges as a reluctant hero, having navigated the treacherous waters of morality and ambition, while Bud's journey reflects the struggle between his violent nature and his desire for justice. The film ends with a poignant reminder of the complexities of human nature and the often-unseen battles fought in the name of justice.
Script Level Analysis
This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.
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Analysis of the Scene Percentiles
- Strong character development with a high characters rating (81.25), indicating well-crafted and relatable characters.
- High conflict level (88.19), suggesting that the screenplay effectively engages the audience with compelling conflicts.
- Excellent dialogue rating (80.56), showcasing the writer's ability to create authentic and engaging conversations.
- Formatting score (54.47) is below average; the writer should ensure adherence to industry-standard formatting to enhance readability.
- Emotional impact (55.56) could be improved; the writer might focus on deepening emotional connections between characters and the audience.
- Engagement score (54.07) indicates a need for more captivating elements to keep the audience invested throughout the screenplay.
The writer appears to be more intuitive, with strengths in character and dialogue, but lower scores in concept and structure.
Balancing Elements- Enhance the emotional depth of scenes to improve emotional impact while maintaining strong character development.
- Work on pacing (58.13) to ensure that the story flows smoothly and keeps the audience engaged.
- Consider refining the structure score (63.82) to better support the plot and character arcs.
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Overall AssessmentThe screenplay shows strong character and dialogue elements, but it would benefit from improvements in formatting, emotional impact, and engagement to reach its full potential.
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Executive Summary
- The screenplay opens with a powerful montage that sets the tone for the film, effectively establishing the socio-political landscape of Los Angeles in the 1950s. This is complemented by strong character introductions that immediately engage the audience. high ( Scene Sequence number 1 (Opening montage) Scene Sequence number 3 (Jack Vincennes at the Christmas party) )
- The dialogue throughout the screenplay is sharp and engaging, revealing character motivations and conflicts without feeling forced. The interactions between characters, especially in high-stakes situations, are particularly well-crafted. high ( Scene Sequence number 7 (Chief's office) Scene Sequence number 39 (Loew's office) )
- The climax of the screenplay is intense and satisfying, tying together various plot threads while delivering a powerful resolution to the character arcs. The stakes feel real, and the emotional weight of the characters' journeys culminates effectively. high ( Scene Sequence number 42 (Final confrontation with Dudley) )
- Character development is a significant strength, particularly in how Bud White's violent tendencies are juxtaposed with his moral compass. His interactions with women and his motivations are explored deeply, adding layers to his character. high ( Scene Sequence number 4 (Bud White at the liquor store) )
- The screenplay effectively uses setting and atmosphere to enhance the narrative, with Los Angeles itself becoming a character that reflects the themes of ambition, corruption, and the pursuit of the American Dream. high ( Scene Sequence number 10 (Hollywood High School) )
- Some scenes could benefit from tighter pacing, particularly during the exposition-heavy moments. While the dialogue is engaging, certain exchanges feel drawn out and could be streamlined for better flow. medium ( Scene Sequence number 12 (Bud and Exley confrontation) )
- The emotional impact of certain character deaths could be heightened. While the stakes are clear, the reactions of the characters to these events sometimes lack the depth that could enhance the audience's connection. medium ( Scene Sequence number 14 (Morgue scene) )
- There is a lack of exploration into the personal lives of secondary characters, which could add depth to the narrative. More background on characters like Stensland and Meeks would enrich the story. medium ( Scene Sequence number 5 (Dispatch desk) )
- The screenplay's ability to maintain tension and suspense throughout is commendable. The final confrontation is not only action-packed but also emotionally charged, showcasing the culmination of the characters' arcs. high ( Scene Sequence number 41 (Final confrontation) )
- Character motivations While the main characters are well-developed, some secondary characters lack clear motivations, which can lead to confusion about their actions and roles in the story. For example, the motivations behind certain antagonists could be more fleshed out to enhance the narrative. medium
- Overly expository dialogue At times, the dialogue leans towards exposition, where characters explain their thoughts and feelings rather than showing them through action or subtext. This can detract from the authenticity of the characters and the overall flow of the screenplay. medium
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Executive Summary
- The opening montage effectively establishes the tone, setting, and key themes of the screenplay, introducing the audience to the conflicting images of a booming, optimistic Los Angeles and the underlying criminal elements that threaten to undermine the city's veneer of progress. high ( Scene 1 (L.A. Confidential) )
- The scene in the morgue, where Bud White and Ed Exley identify the body of Susan Lefferts, is a powerful and emotional moment that deepens our understanding of the characters and the stakes involved in the case. medium ( Scene 9 (INT. COUNTY MORGUE - EXAMINATION ROOM - DAY) )
- The climactic showdown at the Victory Motel is a well-executed, suspenseful set piece that brings the various narrative threads together in a gripping and satisfying conclusion. high ( Scene 19 (INT. VICTORY MOTEL - NIGHT) )
- The screenplay's exploration of moral ambiguity and the blurred lines between good and evil is a consistent strength, as it challenges the audience's preconceptions and avoids simplistic resolutions. high
- The well-developed characters, each with their own distinct motivations and arcs, are a significant strength, as they drive the narrative in a compelling and believable way. high
- While the screenplay is generally well-paced, there are a few instances where the narrative may feel slightly uneven or rushed, particularly in the transitions between the various storylines and character arcs. medium
- Some of the dialogue, while generally strong, could benefit from a bit more refinement and polish to ensure a consistent and natural-sounding voice across all characters. low
- The screenplay could potentially benefit from a more overt exploration of the broader social and political context of 1950s Los Angeles, as this backdrop helps to inform the characters' motivations and the stakes of the narrative. medium
- The opening sequence sets the stage for the complex, layered narrative to come, establishing the various power structures and criminal elements at play in Los Angeles. high ( Scene 1 (L.A. Confidential) )
- The scene between Bud White and Lynn Bracken, where their relationship and character arcs intersect, is a standout moment that highlights the screenplay's nuanced exploration of human relationships and moral complexity. medium ( Scene 16 (INT. 1736 NOTTINGHAM (LYNN BRACKEN'S) - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT) )
- The climactic showdown at the Victory Motel is a thrilling and well-executed set piece that brings the various narrative threads together in a satisfying and impactful way. high ( Scene 41 (INT. VICTORY MOTEL - ROOM 6 - NIGHT) )
- Lack of Diverse Representation While the screenplay does a strong job of exploring the moral complexities of its central characters, it could potentially benefit from a more diverse range of perspectives and experiences. The majority of the main characters are white, and the screenplay could be strengthened by the inclusion of more diverse voices and narratives, particularly in relation to the broader social and political context of 1950s Los Angeles. medium
- Occasionally Uneven Pacing While the screenplay is generally well-paced, there are a few instances where the narrative may feel slightly rushed or uneven, particularly in the transitions between the various storylines and character arcs. This could be addressed with some additional refinement and polish. low
Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 8.7, The screenplay effectively establishes complex and intriguing characters, showcasing their internal struggles and moral ambiguities. While the core characters, Bud, Exley, and Jack, exhibit strong arcs, some supporting figures could be further developed for a richer narrative experience. Overall, the characters are compelling and drive the story's themes of corruption, justice, and redemption. See More
Premise: 7.1, The screenplay's premise, set in 1950s Los Angeles, skillfully utilizes the era's moral ambiguity and noir atmosphere to create intrigue. However, it could benefit from a more distinct hook that highlights the unique angle of the narrative and engages the audience from the very beginning. See More
Structure: 7.8, The screenplay displays a strong foundation in structure and plot development, particularly in its portrayal of morally ambiguous characters navigating a corrupt world. It effectively builds tension and suspense through its use of multiple plotlines and a gritty, realistic tone. However, the pacing can feel uneven, and certain plot threads could be further developed to enhance narrative clarity and character arcs. See More
Theme: 7.6, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes of corruption, ambition, and the moral ambiguity of justice in a postwar Los Angeles setting. However, while the themes are clear, their exploration could be deepened through more nuanced character development and greater thematic integration within the narrative. The film's message of the corrupting influence of power and the difficult choices faced by those seeking justice is impactful but could be more resonant with a more profound exploration of the characters' internal struggles. See More
Visual Impact: 7.5, The screenplay demonstrates strong potential for visual storytelling, utilizing vivid descriptions and contrasting settings to convey the atmosphere of postwar Los Angeles. It effectively portrays the tension between the city's glamour and its underbelly, but could be enhanced by further integrating visual elements with character arcs and thematic development. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.1, This screenplay demonstrates a strong foundation for emotional engagement, featuring compelling characters navigating a morally gray world of crime and corruption. However, the emotional depth and resonance could be heightened by further exploring the internal conflicts of key characters, weaving in more moments of vulnerability and introspection, and adding a layer of emotional complexity to the narrative. See More
Conflict: 7.5, The screenplay effectively establishes conflict, particularly through the internal struggles of its characters and the moral ambiguity of the setting. However, the stakes, while present, lack a consistent escalation, leading to a somewhat uneven sense of tension and urgency. The screenplay could benefit from strategically increasing the stakes, connecting them more deeply to character arcs, and ensuring a more satisfyingly resolved conflict. See More
Originality: 7.9, The screenplay showcases a compelling blend of originality and creativity, particularly in its character development and thematic exploration of morality within a corrupt system. The intertwining narratives of the characters, especially Bud White, Jack Vincennes, and Ed Exley, provide a fresh perspective on the classic noir genre, while the vivid settings and intricate plotlines enhance its uniqueness. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
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Character Dudley Smith
Description Dudley's behavior in these scenes seems inconsistent with his established character. He's typically a tough, no-nonsense cop who doesn't hesitate to use force. In these scenes, he's oddly passive, almost encouraging the use of violence by his men, even though it's likely to cause problems for the department. This inconsistency undermines his established character arc.
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Character Bud White
Description While Bud is usually brutal and aggressive, his outburst of rage against Hudgeons seems excessive. He's already established as someone who prefers direct action, but this scene feels like he's suddenly gone off the deep end. This inconsistency might be a way to emphasize his emotional state, but it also feels a bit out of place.
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Character Exley
Description Exley's interrogation techniques, especially his use of homophobic slurs, seem out of character. He's shown to be ambitious and calculating, but his reliance on such tactics feels out of place. While it might be intended to show his desperation, it also comes across as manipulative and insensitive.
( Scene 19 )
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Description The sudden change in Exley's character arc feels somewhat abrupt. He's been shown as ambitious and willing to bend the rules for his own gain. His decision to take down Dudley, seemingly driven by a sense of justice, feels somewhat inconsistent with his earlier actions.
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Description The motive for killing Stensland is unclear. It's implied that he was going to sell the heroin to Dudley, but it's never fully explained why Dudley would kill him. This creates a plot hole that weakens the narrative.
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Description The motivation for the attack on Hudgeons remains unclear. While he reveals information about Patchett, his value as a witness is questionable. This plot hole makes the attack feel arbitrary and weakens the overall narrative.
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Description The dialogue in these scenes feels somewhat forced and unnatural. The characters' use of slang and racial epithets feels overly exaggerated and doesn't quite ring true to the era. The dialogue in these scenes needs more authenticity and should avoid excessive use of slang or stereotypes.
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Exley - Score: 81/100
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Bud - Score: 81/100
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Dudley - Score: 84/100
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Jack - Score: 81/100
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Lynn - Score: 77/100
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Identified Themes
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Corruption and Power
80%
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The screenplay explores the corruption within the LAPD, with high-ranking officers like Dudley Smith and Pierce Patchett using their positions for personal gain. This theme is further exemplified by the connection between organized crime and police officials, as seen in Mickey Cohen's operation and the involvement of various officers in illegal activities.
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This theme underscores the dangers of unchecked power and the erosion of trust when those in positions of authority abuse their power for personal benefit. It highlights the conflict between upholding the law and succumbing to corruption, particularly within a system designed to protect citizens. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Corruption and Power
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Moral Ambiguity
70%
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The characters in the screenplay operate in a gray area, where lines between right and wrong are blurred. Bud White, despite his commitment to justice, uses violence and questionable methods to achieve his goals. Exley, while striving for integrity, is tempted by power and the potential for advancement. Jack Vincennes is a morally compromised officer who uses his position for personal gain. These characters demonstrate the complexities of human nature and the challenges of maintaining moral clarity in a corrupt environment.
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This theme highlights the struggle of navigating ethical dilemmas and the internal conflict individuals face when trying to uphold their principles in a system riddled with corruption and moral compromises. It underscores the difficulty of maintaining integrity in the face of temptation and the consequences of making difficult choices. | ||||||||||||
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The American Dream and its Disillusionment
60%
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The screenplay contrasts the postwar optimism and the pursuit of the American Dream with the realities of crime, corruption, and disillusionment in Los Angeles. Characters like Bud White and Exley struggle to reconcile their ideals with the harsh realities of the city. The depiction of the city's underbelly exposes the dark side of success and the consequences of unchecked ambition.
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This theme explores the complexities of the American Dream, showcasing the potential for both success and disillusionment. It emphasizes the challenges of navigating a society where corruption and power struggles can overshadow the pursuit of happiness and personal fulfillment. | ||||||||||||
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The Power of Influence and Manipulation
50%
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The screenplay highlights how individuals with power and influence can manipulate others for their own benefit. Dudley Smith uses his position to control and exploit others, while Pierce Patchett utilizes his wealth and connections to operate illicit businesses. These characters demonstrate the destructive nature of power and the ability of those with influence to corrupt individuals and institutions.
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This theme underscores the importance of accountability and the need for checks and balances to prevent abuse of power. It showcases how influence can be used to control and manipulate others, leading to negative consequences for individuals and society as a whole. | ||||||||||||
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Redemption and Second Chances
40%
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Despite the pervasive corruption, the screenplay suggests the possibility of redemption and second chances. Exley, initially tempted by power, ultimately chooses to uphold his integrity. Bud White, despite his violent methods, shows compassion and a desire for a better life. Jack Vincennes, though morally compromised, attempts to make amends for his actions. These characters illustrate the human capacity for growth and change, even in the face of adversity.
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This theme offers a glimmer of hope amidst the darkness, showing that even individuals who have made mistakes can strive for redemption and change their paths. It emphasizes the importance of second chances and the possibility of personal growth and transformation. | ||||||||||||
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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| internal Goals | Throughout the script, the protagonist's internal goals evolve from seeking personal validation and integrity in a corrupt environment to a deeper commitment towards justice, truth, and protecting the vulnerable. This journey reflects the struggle to maintain ethical standards amidst pervasive corruption. |
| External Goals | The protagonist's external goals transition from merely upholding the law and gaining recognition within the LAPD to actively dismantling the criminal underworld in Los Angeles and uncovering the truth behind corrupt practices in the police force. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict focuses on the clash between the ideals of justice and the realities of corruption within the LAPD. As the protagonist grapples with the dichotomy between his moral compass and the corrupt practices surrounding him, his journey becomes a reflection on the struggle to uphold integrity in a morally ambiguous world. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals shape his development from a conflicted officer to a more resolute individual dedicated to seeking justice, demonstrating increased moral fortitude, the importance of allies, and the cost of integrity in a corrupt system.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The evolving goals and philosophical conflicts drive the narrative structure by creating tension and stakes that propel the plot forward, as each character's motivations and decisions intertwine to shape the unfolding drama of crime and justice in Los Angeles.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts enrich the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of morality, integrity, and the complexities of human behavior, ultimately posing questions about the nature of good and evil within systems designed to uphold order.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
| 1 - Dreams and Shadows: The Duality of Los Angeles | Sleazy, Gritty, Cynical, Dark | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 2 - Christmas Confrontations | Intense, Gritty, Dark, Tense, Violent | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 3 - A Christmas Bust | Sarcastic, Cynical, Dark | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 4 - Tension on Hollywood Boulevard | Tense, Mysterious, Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 5 - Principles and Party: A Night at the Precinct | Serious, Intense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 6 - Chaos in the Precinct | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 7 - Loyalty and Ambition | Serious, Intense, Authoritative, Manipulative, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 8 - Tension in the Witness Room | Suspenseful, Intense, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 9 - A Dark Proposition | Gritty, Intense, Suspenseful, Cynical | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 10 - Shadows of Hollywood | Suspenseful, Dark, Intense, Dramatic, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 11 - Tensions Rise in the Briefing Room | No-nonsense, Hatred, Admiration, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 12 - A Night of Secrets and Bloodshed | Suspenseful, Dark, Intense, Serious, Mysterious | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 13 - Revelations in the Dark | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 14 - A Mother's Grief and the Pursuit of Justice | Suspenseful, Gritty, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 15 - Tension at the Pink Mansion | Suspenseful, Intense, Confrontational, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 16 - Tension at Lynn's Place | Tense, Dramatic, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 17 - Tangled Truths | Intense, Confrontational, Mysterious, Seductive | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 18 - Tensions at the Tevere Hotel | Tense, Suspenseful, Serious, Action-packed | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 19 - Interrogation Tactics | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 20 - Justice in the Shadows | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful, Violent | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 21 - Aftermath of Violence | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 22 - Tensions and Triumphs | Suspense, Tension, Doubt, Ambiguity, Conflict | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 23 - Tensions at the Fundraiser | Suspenseful, Cynical, Dark, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 24 - Shadows of Violence and Affection | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful, Emotional, Tense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 25 - Reflections in the Night | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 26 - Unraveling the Past | Investigative, Intense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 27 - Unearthing Secrets | Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 28 - Uncovering Truths | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional, Dark | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 29 - Reluctant Allies | Tense, Reflective, Confrontational, Regretful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 30 - Tension at the Brown Derby | Tense, Suspenseful, Intense, Mysterious, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 31 - Misunderstandings at the Brown Derby | Tense, Confrontational, Sarcastic, Intense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 32 - Tension and Temptation | Tense, Intimate, Confrontational, Sensual | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 33 - Intimacy and Urgency | Intense, Emotional, Tense, Passionate, Intriguing | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 34 - Betrayal in the Kitchen | Suspenseful, Dark, Intense, Mysterious, Intriguing | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 35 - Tensions Unleashed at the Victory Motel | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 36 - Tensions Unleashed | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 37 - Confrontation in the Records Room | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Revealing | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 38 - The Aftermath of Deceit | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 39 - Confrontation in the DA's Office | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Violent | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 40 - Tension at the Victory Motel | Tense, Resigned, Suspenseful, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 41 - Sacrifice at the Victory Motel | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Action-packed | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 42 - Betrayal at the Victory Motel | Tense, Dramatic, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
| 43 - Bittersweet Farewell | Tense, Emotional, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are insights from the scene-level analysis, highlighting strengths, weaknesses, and actionable suggestions.
Some points may appear in both strengths and weaknesses due to scene variety.
Tip: Click on criteria in the top row for detailed summaries.
Scene Strengths
- Intense conflict
- Sharp dialogue
- Complex characters
- Tension-building
- Engaging dialogue
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited emotional depth in this particular scene
- Some cliched elements in the dialogue
- Limited character development in some secondary characters
- Potential for excessive violence
- Lack of resolution for some conflicts
Suggestions
- Explore more emotional depth in scenes to add depth and impact
- Avoid cliches in dialogue and strive for unique and authentic voices for each character
- Take time to develop secondary characters to flesh out the world and create stronger subplots
- Be mindful of the level of violence in the story and consider if it adds or detracts from the narrative
- Ensure all conflicts have satisfying resolutions to avoid leaving loose ends
Scene 1 - Dreams and Shadows: The Duality of Los Angeles
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 2 - Christmas Confrontations
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 3 - A Christmas Bust
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 4 - Tension on Hollywood Boulevard
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 5 - Principles and Party: A Night at the Precinct
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 6 - Chaos in the Precinct
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 7 - Loyalty and Ambition
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 8 - Tension in the Witness Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 9 - A Dark Proposition
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 10 - Shadows of Hollywood
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 11 - Tensions Rise in the Briefing Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 12 - A Night of Secrets and Bloodshed
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 13 - Revelations in the Dark
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 14 - A Mother's Grief and the Pursuit of Justice
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 15 - Tension at the Pink Mansion
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 16 - Tension at Lynn's Place
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 17 - Tangled Truths
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 18 - Tensions at the Tevere Hotel
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 19 - Interrogation Tactics
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 20 - Justice in the Shadows
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 21 - Aftermath of Violence
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 22 - Tensions and Triumphs
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 23 - Tensions at the Fundraiser
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 24 - Shadows of Violence and Affection
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 25 - Reflections in the Night
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 26 - Unraveling the Past
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 27 - Unearthing Secrets
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 28 - Uncovering Truths
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 29 - Reluctant Allies
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 30 - Tension at the Brown Derby
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 31 - Misunderstandings at the Brown Derby
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 32 - Tension and Temptation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 33 - Intimacy and Urgency
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 34 - Betrayal in the Kitchen
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 35 - Tensions Unleashed at the Victory Motel
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 36 - Tensions Unleashed
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 37 - Confrontation in the Records Room
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 38 - The Aftermath of Deceit
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 39 - Confrontation in the DA's Office
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 40 - Tension at the Victory Motel
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 41 - Sacrifice at the Victory Motel
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 42 - Betrayal at the Victory Motel
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 43 - Bittersweet Farewell
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
- Physical environment: The screenplay depicts a gritty and glamorous Los Angeles in the 1950s, characterized by a stark contrast between opulent mansions, bustling city streets, and seedy underbelly locations like back alleys, rundown motels, and dimly lit bars. The iconic landmarks like Grauman's Chinese Theater and the Federal Courthouse represent the city's glamorous façade, while the bean fields and construction sites showcase the rapid urban development. The presence of palm trees, city lights, and iconic architecture adds to the visual appeal and creates a sense of both allure and danger.
- Culture: The cultural elements of the screenplay are heavily influenced by the 1950s, showcasing the era's post-war optimism, Hollywood glamour, and burgeoning celebrity culture. The characters engage in a fast-paced lifestyle filled with lavish parties, illicit activities, and a constant striving for success. The presence of sleazy tabloid journalism, organized crime, and a corrupt police force highlights the darker side of this seemingly glamorous world.
- Society: The society depicted in the screenplay is hierarchical and rife with corruption. Power dynamics are evident in the interactions between law enforcement officers, criminals, and politicians. The characters navigate a world where loyalty and betrayal are paramount, and moral ambiguity is the norm. The screenplay explores the themes of justice, honor, and the struggle for power within this morally gray world.
- Technology: The technological elements of the screenplay are limited to the 1950s, reflecting the technological advancements of the time. Telephones, radios, and cars are prominent features of the world, while more advanced technologies are absent, emphasizing the more human-centered nature of the narrative.
- Characters influence: The world elements shape the characters' experiences and actions by creating a constant tension between the allure of the glamorous life and the harsh realities of crime and corruption. Characters like Bud White are forced to confront their own morality and make difficult choices, while others like Jack Vincennes are drawn into a web of deceit and violence. The world's corruption influences characters' choices and motivations, leading them down paths of both ambition and despair.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements are essential to the narrative of the screenplay. The setting of Los Angeles in the 1950s provides a backdrop for a compelling story of crime, corruption, and redemption. The characters' actions are driven by the world's complex societal structures and the ever-present threat of violence. The screenplay's plot is intricately intertwined with the world's moral ambiguity, creating a sense of suspense and intrigue.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring universal themes of morality, power, and the human condition. The characters' struggles against the corrupt system and the constant threat of violence raise questions about justice, loyalty, and the nature of good and evil. The screenplay uses the unique world of 1950s Los Angeles to examine timeless issues that resonate with audiences today.
| Voice Analysis | |
|---|---|
| Summary: | The writer's voice is a gritty and morally ambiguous blend of film noir and crime drama, with a sharp, cynical wit that permeates the dialogue and narrative. The screenplay is set in a noirish 1950s Los Angeles, characterized by corruption, violence, and a constant tension between the glamorous facade and the dark underbelly of the city. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a complex and unsettling atmosphere, exploring themes of loyalty, corruption, justice, and the human cost of ambition. The sharp, cynical dialogue and vivid descriptions of the city's contrasting elements enhance the mood of tension and suspense, immersing the audience in a world where moral boundaries are constantly tested. |
| Best Representation Scene | 9 - A Dark Proposition |
| Best Scene Explanation | This scene is a great representation of the writer's voice because it effectively captures the blend of gritty realism, moral ambiguity, and sharp dialogue that defines the screenplay. The scene features a tense confrontation between Bud and Dudley, where the writer uses dialogue and actions to showcase the themes of corruption, loyalty, and the dark side of the police force. The scene is also notable for its use of vivid descriptions, such as the bloodied brass knuckles, which create a palpable sense of danger and intrigue, further immersing the audience in the world of the screenplay. |
Style and Similarities
The screenplay exhibits a strong, gritty, and often morally ambiguous style, heavily influenced by crime noir and thriller genres. It features complex characters navigating difficult situations in a world where right and wrong are not always clear.
Style Similarities:
| Writer | Explanation |
|---|---|
| James Ellroy | Ellroy's influence is evident in numerous scenes, particularly those exploring themes of corruption, betrayal, and the darker aspects of society. His gritty, noir-inspired style, with a focus on complex characters and morally ambiguous plots, is a recurring theme. |
| David Fincher | Fincher's dark and atmospheric storytelling style, often exploring themes of crime, mystery, and psychological depth, is frequently reflected in the screenplay. His focus on meticulously crafted scenes, suspenseful plot twists, and complex character relationships resonates throughout. |
| David Ayer | Ayer's gritty and realistic portrayal of law enforcement and crime, particularly in urban settings, is a significant influence. His intense action sequences, morally complex characters, and exploration of corruption within the system align with the screenplay's overall tone. |
| David Mamet | Mamet's signature sharp dialogue and focus on power dynamics and moral dilemmas are present in several scenes. The screenplay's use of intense character interactions, revealing character motivations through witty banter, reflects Mamet's style. |
Other Similarities: The screenplay blends the styles of these prominent writers seamlessly, creating a distinctive and engaging narrative. While Ellroy and Fincher's influences are particularly prevalent, Ayer and Mamet contribute significant aspects of the screenplay's tone and dialogue, resulting in a complex and multifaceted storytelling experience.
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| High Stakes and Emotional Impact | Scenes with higher 'High Stakes' scores tend to have higher 'Emotional Impact' scores, suggesting that raising the stakes effectively increases the emotional resonance of the scenes. |
| Intense Scenes and Character Changes | Scenes with a high 'Intense' tone are more likely to feature 'Character Changes', indicating that intense situations often drive character development. |
| Suspense and Dialogue Quality | Scenes with higher 'Suspenseful' tones generally have better 'Dialogue' scores, implying that well-written dialogue enhances suspense and keeps the audience engaged. |
| Dark Tone and Conflict | Scenes with a 'Dark' tone are consistently associated with high 'Conflict' scores, suggesting that darkness often fuels conflict and tension. |
| Confrontational Scenes and Emotional Intensity | Scenes with a 'Confrontational' tone often result in higher 'Emotional Impact' scores, emphasizing the power of confrontations to evoke strong emotions. |
| Action-Packed Scenes and Character Development | While not always present, a tendency for scenes with a high 'Action-packed' tone to also include 'Character Changes' suggests that action can serve as a catalyst for character growth. |
| Plot and Concept Harmony | The high scores across 'Plot' and 'Concept' indicate that the story is well-structured and the core idea is effectively translated into compelling narrative. |
| Dialogue and Emotional Impact | There is a slight tendency for scenes with stronger 'Dialogue' to have higher 'Emotional Impact' scores, suggesting that well-crafted dialogue can effectively evoke emotions in the audience. |
| Emotional Intensity and Storytelling | The consistently high scores across 'Emotional Impact', 'Move Story Forward', and 'High Stakes' indicate a strong focus on emotional storytelling that propels the narrative. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
Based on the scene analyses, you demonstrate a strong grasp of crime drama conventions and storytelling techniques. Your dialogue is sharp, creating tension and revealing character motivations effectively. You excel at building suspense through plot twists, action, and complex character interactions. You've also demonstrated the ability to explore moral ambiguity and ethical dilemmas, adding depth to your narrative. The scenes showcased a strong foundation in creating engaging conflicts and morally complex characters, with a focus on 1950s Los Angeles.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Book | 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book offers valuable insights into screenplay structure and character development, focusing on creating compelling narratives and engaging characters. It will help you master the art of pacing and ensure that your scenes flow seamlessly, building towards a satisfying climax. |
| Screenplays | Read screenplays from classic film noirs like 'Double Indemnity' and 'Touch of Evil', and contemporary crime thrillers like 'The Departed' and 'Zodiac'. | These films exemplify strong character development, engaging dialogue, and suspenseful plot twists within the crime genre. Studying their structure, pacing, and characterization will provide valuable insights to enhance your own storytelling. |
| Book | 'Screenplay: The Foundations of Screenwriting' by Syd Field | This book provides a comprehensive understanding of screenplay structure and formatting, guiding you through the key elements of a compelling narrative. It will help you understand the different stages of a screenplay and how to craft a compelling story with a clear beginning, middle, and end. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Corrupt Authority | Dudley Smith, a senior officer, is revealed to be involved in organized crime and corruption within the LAPD. | This trope involves a figure of authority who abuses their power for personal gain. A classic example is in 'The Wire,' where various police officers are shown to be complicit in corruption. |
| The Anti-Hero | Bud White is portrayed as a violent yet compassionate officer, struggling with his moral compass. | An anti-hero is a central character who lacks conventional heroic attributes. An example is Walter White from 'Breaking Bad,' who engages in illegal activities for personal reasons but has moments of moral complexity. |
| Love Triangle | Bud White, Exley, and Lynn Bracken are involved in a complicated romantic dynamic. | A love triangle involves three characters where romantic interests conflict. A well-known example is in 'Twilight' with Bella, Edward, and Jacob. |
| The Fall from Grace | Exley experiences a moral decline as he navigates the corrupt world of the LAPD. | This trope involves a character who loses their integrity or status due to their actions. An example is Michael Corleone in 'The Godfather,' who transforms from a war hero to a ruthless mob boss. |
| The Mentor | Dudley Smith serves as a mentor figure to Exley, guiding him through the complexities of police work. | The mentor trope involves a wise character who provides guidance to a younger or less experienced character. An example is Mr. Miyagi in 'The Karate Kid.' |
| The Femme Fatale | Lynn Bracken embodies the femme fatale archetype, using her charm and allure to manipulate the male characters. | A femme fatale is a seductive woman who leads men into dangerous situations. An example is Catherine Tramell in 'Basic Instinct.' |
| The Buddy Cop | Bud White and Exley initially work together as a mismatched pair of police officers. | The buddy cop trope features two contrasting characters who team up to solve a crime. A classic example is 'Lethal Weapon' with Riggs and Murtaugh. |
| The Big Bad | Mickey Cohen serves as the primary antagonist, representing organized crime in Los Angeles. | The big bad is the main villain who poses a significant threat to the protagonists. An example is Voldemort in the 'Harry Potter' series. |
| The Investigation | The plot revolves around the investigation of organized crime and corruption within the LAPD. | This trope involves characters uncovering secrets and solving mysteries. An example is 'True Detective,' where detectives investigate a series of murders. |
Memorable lines in the script:
| Scene Number | Line |
|---|---|
| 34 | Jack: Rollo Tomasi... |
| 10 | Brett Chase: To protect and serve. It's not just a motto. |
| 40 | Exley: Forget everything else for a second, Lynn. Is there anything you can give me on Dudley Smith? |
| 8 | Jack: Just remember, Bud White'll fuck you for this if it takes the rest of his life. They already suspended him. Just pray he cops a deal and stays on the Department because that is one civilian you do not want on your case. |
| 3 | Sid Hudgens: It's Christmas morning in the City of Angels, and while decent citizens sleep the sleep of the righteous, hopheads prowl for marijuana, not knowing that a man is coming to stop them. |
Some Loglines to consider:
| Array ( [0] => Corruption and violence come to light in 1950s Los Angeles as a group of characters navigate the city's dark underbelly. [1] => Bud White, Sergeant Jack Vincennes, and Ed Exley find themselves embroiled in a conspiracy involving police corruption and organized crime in 1950s Los Angeles. [2] => Uncovering a call girl operation and a mass shooting leads to a deadly confrontation between characters in this gritty film set in 1950s Los Angeles. [3] => The lines between good and evil blur as characters confront their own moral dilemmas in their efforts to expose police brutality and corruption in 1950s Los Angeles. [4] => The city's underbelly is exposed as Bud White, Sergeant Jack Vincennes, and Ed Exley navigate drug busts and investigate a mass shooting at a diner in 1950s Los Angeles. ) |
| In 1950s Los Angeles, a group of disparate police officers and criminal elements navigate a complex web of corruption, murder, and organized crime, each driven by their own moral compass and competing agendas. |
| A noir-tinged crime drama set in the booming, optimistic Los Angeles of the 1950s, where a group of police officers uncover a deeply rooted conspiracy of corruption and violence that threatens to tear the city apart. |
| A group of LAPD officers, each with their own secrets and motivations, find themselves caught up in a tangled web of organized crime, murder, and moral ambiguity as they try to maintain order in a rapidly changing Los Angeles. |
| In the bustling, sun-drenched Los Angeles of the 1950s, a series of interconnected crimes and cover-ups force a group of police officers to confront their own moral failings and the dark underbelly of the city they're sworn to protect. |
| A sophisticated crime drama that explores the blurred lines between law and lawlessness, as a group of LAPD officers navigate a complex and ever-shifting landscape of power, corruption, and personal redemption in 1950s Los Angeles. |
| In 1950s Los Angeles, three cops navigate a web of corruption and deceit as they uncover a conspiracy that threatens to destroy them all. |
| Amidst the glamour of Hollywood, a trio of detectives must confront their own demons while unraveling a murder that leads to the heart of organized crime. |
| As the city of angels descends into chaos, three unlikely allies must band together to expose the truth behind a series of brutal killings. |
| In a city where dreams are built on lies, a determined detective seeks justice for a fallen comrade, uncovering a conspiracy that runs deeper than he ever imagined. |
| When a high-profile murder rocks Los Angeles, three cops must confront their own moral compasses to bring the truth to light. |
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