Battlefield Earth
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Promo
USP: This action-packed sci-fi adventure takes you on a captivating journey where humanity fights to survive against monstrous beings and oppressive alien overlords. Join Jonnie, a brave and resourceful protagonist, as he embarks on a perilous quest for a better life. Along the way, he'll encounter a diverse cast of characters, face thrilling challenges, discover advanced technology, and grapple with thought-provoking moral dilemmas. Through Jonnie's extraordinary journey, this script explores the complexities of survival, the indomitable spirit of humanity, and the ultimate battle for freedom. Immerse yourself in a unique world where vivid descriptions, intense action, and emotional depth collide, captivating you from the first page to the explosive finale.
Overview
Genres: Action, Science Fiction, Drama, Thriller, Adventure, Sci-Fi, Fantasy, Horror
Setting: Not specified, but likely a distant future, A mountainous region with a barren and desolate landscape, a deserted town, and a domed city.
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates strong potential with its engaging premise, well-developed protagonist, and effective exploration of relevant themes. However, areas for improvement include enhancing the depth of supporting characters, adding complexity to the plot, and refining the pacing to maintain audience engagement.
Themes: Resistance, Human resilience and adaptability, The importance of unity, Defiance of authority, The power of love, The importance of sacrifice, The dangers of technology, The importance of hope
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflict is between the humans and the Psychlos, an alien race that has invaded and enslaved Earth. The stakes are the survival of humanity and the fate of the planet.
Overall Mood: The overall mood of the screenplay is one of tension, suspense, and hope. The constant threat of the Psychlos and the struggles faced by the humans create a sense of urgency and danger.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: The opening scene, where Parsonstaffer delivers his sermon and the tribe cowers in fear, establishes a dark and oppressive mood.
- Scene 5: The scene where Jonnie and Rock escape from the shopping mall, pursued by the Psychlos, is filled with suspense and action.
- Scene 10: The scene where Jonnie confronts Terl in the security headquarters is a tense and emotional moment that showcases the power struggle between the two characters.
- Scene 15: The final battle scene, where the humans fight back against the Psychlos, is a thrilling and hopeful moment that provides a sense of catharsis and closure.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The film's unique blend of science fiction and Western genres, creating a fresh and exciting cinematic experience.
- Stunning Visuals : The film's stunning visuals, including the desolate landscapes, the advanced alien technology, and the epic battle scenes, would create a visually captivating experience for audiences.
- Strong Characters : The film's well-developed and relatable characters, each with their own motivations and struggles, would draw audiences into the story and make them invested in the characters' fates.
- Relevant Themes : The film's exploration of relevant social and environmental issues, such as oppression, resistance, and the struggle for survival, would resonate with audiences and give the film a deeper meaning beyond entertainment.
Comparable Scripts:
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:High, potentially in the range of $100 million or more
Target Audience Demographics: Adults and young adults interested in science fiction, action, and adventure.
Marketability: The screenplay has a compelling and timely story, strong characters, and stunning visuals that have the potential to captivate audiences.
The unique blend of science fiction and Western elements, as well as the exploration of important social and environmental issues, could appeal to a wide range of viewers.
The film's focus on female empowerment, diversity, and the struggle against oppression could resonate strongly with audiences seeking meaningful and inclusive stories.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong commercial appeal and potential for critical acclaim
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay excels in its **Concept** (93.80%) and **Conflict Level** (94.63%), indicating a strong foundation for an engaging and impactful story.
- The high percentile in **Originality** (91.22%) suggests that the screenplay offers unique and fresh ideas that could stand out in the market.
- The low percentile in **Characters** (2.48%) signifies a need to develop more compelling and well-rounded characters.
- The **Dialogue** (36.78%) and **Internal Goal** (48.65%) scores could benefit from further refinement to enhance the emotional connection and drive the narrative.
The percentile patterns suggest a **conceptual writer**, with higher percentiles in plot, structure, and originality. This indicates a strength in creating intriguing and well-structured stories.
Balancing Elements- To improve balance, the writer could focus on developing more nuanced and relatable characters while maintaining the strong plot and concept elements.
- Enhancing the dialogue and internal goals would strengthen the emotional impact and character motivations.
Conceptual
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has a strong foundation with its compelling concept, conflict, and originality. However, it would benefit from further development in characterization, dialogue, and internal goals to create a more engaging and well-rounded story.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Script Theme | 9.50 | 99 | Coco: 9.25 | Casablanca: 9.50 |
Scene Story Forward | 8.9 | 99 | Inception: 8.8 | face/off: 8.9 |
Scene Conflict Level | 8.9 | 98 | El Mariachi: 8.8 | face/off: 8.9 |
Scene High Stakes | 9.0 | 95 | Rambo First Blood Part II: 8.9 | face/off: 9.0 |
Scene Plot | 8.5 | 91 | Enemy of the State: 8.4 | the dark knight rises: 8.5 |
Script Visual Impact | 8.75 | 91 | Deep Cover: 8.50 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.75 |
Script Conflict | 8.50 | 90 | Coco: 8.25 | True Blood: 8.50 |
Scene Concept | 8.4 | 88 | The Greatest Showman: 8.3 | fight Club: 8.4 |
Scene Pacing | 8.55 | 83 | Fear and loathing in Las Vegas: 8.54 | the 5th element: 8.55 |
Scene Originality | 8.90 | 81 | the 5th element: 8.89 | Pawn sacrifice: 8.90 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.83 | 78 | Breaking bad: 7.82 | Battlefield Earth: 7.83 |
Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 76 | Almost Famous: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.1 | 67 | Cruel Intentions: 7.0 | Knives Out: 7.1 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 7.9 | 62 | American Hustle: 7.8 | fight Club: 7.9 |
Scene Overall | 8.4 | 61 | Zootopia: 8.3 | Knives Out: 8.4 |
Script Emotional Impact | 8.00 | 60 | Swingers: 7.75 | Titanic: 8.00 |
Scene External Goal | 7.14 | 41 | Stranger Things: 7.13 | Psycho: 7.14 |
Script Premise | 7.75 | 39 | Inception: 7.50 | There's something about Mary: 7.75 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.5 | 33 | Witness: 7.4 | Titanic: 7.5 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 27 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Overall Script | 7.80 | 22 | LA confidential - draft: 7.79 | True Blood: 7.80 |
Script Structure | 7.50 | 19 | Memento: 7.25 | True Blood: 7.50 |
Script Characters | 7.50 | 9 | 500 days of summer: 7.25 | severance (TV): 7.50 |
Script Originality | 7.25 | 7 | Breaking bad: 7.00 | the dark knight rises: 7.25 |
Scene Characters | 7.7 | 4 | Ghostbusters: 7.6 | the 5th element: 7.7 |
Script Structure | 7.83 | 0 | - | Battlefield Earth: 7.83 |
Scene Formatting | 7.74 | 0 | - | Battlefield Earth: 7.74 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by vivid descriptions, a focus on internal and external challenges, and thoughtful dialogue that drives the narrative forward.
Best representation: Scene 21 - Preparing for Relocation. Scene 21 effectively showcases the writer's voice through its evocative descriptions of the Denver Public Library, where Jonnie and Terl engage in a tense encounter. The dialogue is sharp and thought-provoking, highlighting Jonnie's determination and Terl's manipulative nature. The scene also serves as a turning point in Jonnie's journey, as he must confront the harsh realities of the Psychlo occupation and make difficult choices to survive.
Memorable Lines:
- Jonnie: Save you ever seen a monster? (Scene 1)
- District Manager Zete: We'll be doing the universe a favor by exterminating the whole lot of them once we finish mining-out their miserable little planet. (Scene 7)
- Terl: There is no way a species as primitive as yours could defeat us. (Scene 24)
- Terl: Stupid humans. (Scene 25)
- Mickey: I know I'm going to die. But so are you. (Scene 42)
Writing Style:
The screenplay features a blend of styles and influences across different scenes, resulting in a diverse and engaging writing style overall.
Style Similarities:
- Christopher Nolan
- Philip K. Dick
- George Miller
- Michael Bay
- Cormac McCarthy
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Engine: Gemini
Consider
Executive Summary
Battlefield Earth presents a captivating sci-fi premise with a strong central character arc and exciting action sequences. However, the screenplay suffers from uneven pacing, underdeveloped characters, and excessive violence. With revisions to address these issues and explore the story's themes and world-building in greater depth, the screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and thought-provoking film.
- The screenplay's premise is high-concept and engaging, presenting a classic underdog story of human resistance against an oppressive alien force. high
- Jonnie's character arc is well-developed, transitioning from a curious young man to a determined leader who inspires a rebellion. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 11 )
- Terl's character, despite being an antagonist, is complex and intriguing. His motivations and internal conflicts add depth to the story. medium ( Scene 7 Scene 10 Scene 36 )
- The action sequences are well-paced and exciting, particularly Jonnie's escape attempts and the final battle for Earth. medium
- The screenplay effectively uses real-world locations and historical events to ground the fantastical elements of the story. medium ( Scene 20 Scene 31 Scene 33 )
- The dialogue often feels clunky and unnatural, with characters delivering exposition rather than engaging in organic conversations. high
- The portrayal of the Psychlos is one-dimensional, lacking nuance or individual personalities beyond their role as antagonists. medium
- The pacing can be uneven, with certain scenes feeling rushed while others drag, particularly in the first act. medium
- The use of violence, particularly towards animals, is excessive and gratuitous, potentially alienating some viewers. medium ( Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 37 )
- The technological aspects of the story, such as the teleportation and learning machines, are not adequately explained or explored. low ( Scene 5 Scene 30 )
- The female characters, particularly Chrissy, are underdeveloped and lack agency in the overall narrative. high
- The screenplay could benefit from exploring the cultural and societal impact of the Psychlo occupation on the surviving humans. medium
- The emotional consequences of Jonnie's actions and the losses he experiences are not fully explored, leaving his character arc somewhat incomplete. medium
- The use of the Learning Machine as a plot device is intriguing but raises questions about the ethics and implications of forced knowledge acquisition. medium ( Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 )
- The discovery that the surviving human populations are concentrated in areas with high radiation levels adds a layer of complexity to the story's world-building. low ( Scene 32 )
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Battlefield Earth' is a well-crafted and ambitious science fiction story that effectively blends action, character development, and thematic exploration. The worldbuilding is strong, the protagonist's journey is compelling, and the resistance effort against the Psychlo occupation is thoughtfully conceived and executed. While there are a few areas that could use some refinement, the screenplay as a whole is a compelling and engaging read that is worthy of recommendation.
- The opening scenes effectively establish the post-apocalyptic setting, the relationships between the characters, and the central conflict of Jonnie's desire to explore beyond the tribe's territory despite the Parson's warnings. high ( Scene 1 (EXT. BARRENMOUNTAINOUS REGION -- DUSK) Scene 2 (EXT. OTHER SIDE OF THE RAVINE -- CONTINUOUS) )
- The scenes where Jonnie learns the Psychlo language and then teaches the other humans demonstrate a strong grasp of character development and the importance of knowledge and education in the resistance effort. high ( Scene 19 (INT. BACKROOM -- CONTINUOUS) Scene 20 (INT. DENVER ZOO -- CAGE -- NIGHT) )
- The planning and execution of the multi-pronged attack on the Psychlo occupation, including the acquisition of weapons and explosives, as well as the decision to target the Psychlo home planet, demonstrate a strong grasp of strategy and tactics. high ( Scene 33 (INT. MINING SITE CAVE -- NIGHT) Scene 34 (EXT. TEXAS -- FORT HOOD -- THE NEXT DAY) )
- The exposition-heavy dialogue where Terl explains the Psychlo's vast interstellar empire feels a bit forced and could be tightened up or delivered in a more organic way. medium ( Scene 24 (EXT. FAR EDGE OF THE FIELD -- OVERLOOKING DENVER -- A LITTLE LATER) )
- The scene where Ker discovers Terl's recording feels a bit contrived, and the resolution of that particular subplot could be strengthened. medium ( Scene 26 (INT. EMPLOYEE RECREATION HALL -- CONTINUOUS) )
- The fate of Chrissy and the other humans in the park after the dome is blown is left unclear, and could have been explored further. medium ( Scene 40 (EXT. TOP OF THE DOME -- CONTINUOUS) )
- The rousing scene where the other human slaves join Jonnie's resistance effort is a powerful moment that resonates with the themes of freedom and self-determination. high ( Scene 29 (EXT. NEXT CAGE -- CONTINUOUS) )
- The climactic showdown between Jonnie and Terl is a thrilling and well-executed action sequence that effectively ramps up the tension and stakes. high ( Scene 41 (EXT. TELEPORTATION PLATFORM -- CONTINUOUS) )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.75, The screenplay's premise effectively establishes a compelling narrative of human resilience against an oppressive alien force. The initial setup, portraying a post-apocalyptic world with intriguing lore and a clear power dynamic, effectively hooks the audience. However, there's room to enhance the originality of the alien invasion trope and delve deeper into the cultural and societal aspects of both human survivors and the Psychlos. See More
Structure: 7.5, This screenplay exhibits strengths in establishing a conflict and driving the narrative forward. However, improving the clarity and complexity of the plot, as well as refining the pacing, would enhance the overall storytelling dynamics and audience engagement. See More
Theme: 9.5, The screenplay effectively explores themes of courage, rebellion, and the fight against oppression. The themes are woven into the narrative through the journey of the main characters, Jonnie and Chrissy, as they lead their people in a fight against the oppressive Psychlos. The screenplay's message is clear and impactful, and it resonates with audiences on a deep level. See More
Visual Impact: 8.75, The screenplay presents vivid and immersive visual imagery that establishes a captivating and believable world for the characters and the narrative. Its innovative use of visual elements and descriptions enhances the storytelling, creating a strong emotional impact and drawing the readers into the screenplay's universe. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.0, The screenplay exhibits exceptional emotional depth through its exploration of diverse themes and profound character arcs. Its strengths lie in the relatability and vulnerability of the characters, the nuanced handling of emotions, and the consistent pacing that builds emotional tension and catharsis. However, the screenplay could benefit from a deeper exploration of the effects of trauma and loss on the characters, which would further enhance its emotional impact. See More
Conflict: 8.5, The screenplay effectively presents compelling conflicts and stakes that drive the narrative forward and engage the audience. It focuses on the human characters' struggle against oppression and the threat of annihilation, creating a sense of urgency and emotional investment. The conflicts are well-defined and integrated within the plot, significantly driving character development and shaping the overall trajectory of the story. See More
Originality: 7.25, The screenplay showcases originality and creativity in its exploration of a post-apocalyptic world where humans struggle against alien oppressors. The narrative features a compelling blend of action, suspense, and social commentary, offering a fresh perspective on the themes of survival, rebellion, and the enduring human spirit. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- A native tribe led by Parsonstaffer huddles outside a cave as he recounts the tale of monstrous beings that wiped out their ancestors. Parsonstaffer emphasizes the need for devotion to appease the gods and prevent a similar fate. Jonnie, harboring doubts about the existence of monsters, questions their teachings. Despite the risks, he decides to leave the tribe on a quest to find a better life, accompanied by his loyal horse, Windsplitter.
- Jonnie sets out on a perilous journey with a medallion from Chrissy, enduring the wilderness and confronting a grizzly bear before reaching a desolate town.
- Jonnie, after escaping a grizzly bear, encounters Carlo and Rock, who share food and discuss the dangers of the dark. They seek shelter in a shopping mall, but are horrified by broken mannequins and Carlo is killed by a monstrous Psycho. Jonnie and Rock flee, leaving Carlo's fate uncertain.
- Jonnie and Rock jump off a building to escape the Psychlos. Rock breaks his leg and Jonnie tries to help him, but a Psychlo aims a gun at Rock. Jonnie whistles for Windsplitter, who charges towards the Psychlo. The Psychlo fires, but Jonnie's kill club knocks the gun aside. Jonnie and Rock flee, but the Psychlo blocks their escape. Jonnie lures the Psychlo into a trap and destroys it, but the Psychlo emits a blast that knocks Jonnie and Windsplitter unconscious.
- Jonnie awakens inside a cage with other terrified men and is transported to Denver. He finds himself imprisoned with several other men, all terrified. The transport vehicle ascends into the sky towards a transparent dome covering the city, which reveals itself to be Denver. The vehicle lands, and the cage is deposited into the back of a truck. The Psychlos insert air-filtration tubes into the prisoners' noses, which Jonnie initially resists until he has difficulty breathing. The truck enters a dome-covered city that has been painted purple and covered in mining soot. The Psychlos take the prisoners to a warehouse complex, where they are met by a clerk who berates the transport Psychlo for only capturing five prisoners.
- Jonnie escapes his cage and makes a run for it, with Carlo behind him. The wrangler tries to stop them, but Carlo manages to get away. The wrangler pulls his gun, but a Psychloclerk tells him not to kill Jonnie. The wrangler fires anyway, but Carlo is only knocked unconscious. The Psychlo wrangler tries to pick up Jonnie, but Jonnie has taken the wrangler's gun and shoots him dead. The other Psychlos laugh, and Jonnie makes a break for it. He runs into Terl, who is not amused. Terl demands to know who let Jonnie escape, and the clerk points to the dead wrangler. Terl orders the clerk to show him how Jonnie shot the wrangler, and the clerk reluctantly does so. Jonnie blasts a hole through the clerk's chest. A bigger Psychlo charges at Jonnie, but Jonnie shoots him back. Terl takes the gun from Jonnie and knocks him to the ground.
- Terl leaves the employee recreation hall after refusing to keep an incident out of the bartender's file. Jonnie is enraged by the destruction of Chrissy's medallion. Ker and Terl arrive at the Denver mining site, with Terl showing indifference towards the humans. The District Manager, Zate, arrives and expresses his disgust at Earth's appearance and his intent to exterminate the humans.
- Inside an Indigenous Labor Identification Station, Jonnie and Mickey are branded with identification numbers. Jonnie rebels and injures the technician with the branding iron. The guards then attack Jonnie.
- Jonnie endures brutal torture while Terl faces disappointment. Conflict erupts between Jonnie and Floyd over food, prompting Jonnie to assert equality in dining. Terl confronts Ker about wasted potential, while the Psychlos maintain control over their human slaves.
- Ker betrays Terl by planting a surveillance photo of a gold vein in his desk, but Terl discovers it and beats Ker. However, Terl then reveals his plan to have Ker pretend there is a mutiny on the planet to warn the Planetship.
- Chrissy anxiously waits for her friend's return on a rock, only to be disappointed when the riderless horse, Windsplitter, arrives. The Planetship fears a worker revolt and considers using man-animals to increase production. Despite initial skepticism, the Planetship decides to bring in more workers and cut their pay instead.
- Chrissy devises a clever plan to escape the ravine, while Jonnie, Mickey, and Sammy strategize a breakout. Teri and Ker engage in a thought-provoking discussion about humans and the significance of the Pioneer One plaque.
- Amidst a discussion about training man-animals, Terl cunningly exposes a recording of Ker advocating theft from the company. Terl exploits this incriminating evidence to set up Ker as a patsy, intending to replace the Planetship and gain leverage over them.
- Terl and Zer discuss the need for leverage over Jonnie to operate mining equipment. Terl suggests using a learning machine to educate Jonnie on Paychlo, despite Zer's concerns about the risks. Ker, skeptical of Terl's plan, captures Jonnie and his friends and transports them to a mining site in a cargo cage. The scene ends with the truck approaching the mining site, leaving Jonnie and his friends uncertain about their fate.
- Our guys flee the truck carrying the empty cage, pursued by Terl and Ker's watchful eyes. Exhaustion and hunger push them towards a cabin, where they encounter rats. After a brief hesitation, they dive into the rodents for sustenance, temporarily resolving their conflict about stopping for food.
- Trapped by Psychlos, Jonnie attempts a daring jump but is blocked. Floyd is killed, and Terl locks Jonnie and Carlo away. Meanwhile, Ker seeks reinforcements from the Denver Warehouse.
- In a private conversation, Terl and the bartender discuss their new arrangement. Meanwhile, the Assistant Planetship is the one-thousandth customer of the month, and Terl disguises himself as him to infiltrate the Psychloreserch Center. He steals confidential materials and successfully forges the Assistant Planetship's signature, displaying his cunning and deception.
- Ker detains Jonnie, Carlo, Mickey, and Sammy, bringing them to a security facility. They're ordered to paint a wall, while Jonnie undergoes language training in a Psychlo learning machine. Despite language barriers, Mickey, Carlo, and Haywood follow Sammy's lead and begin painting.
- While Terl attempts to communicate with Jonnie using a learning machine, Jonnie feigns ignorance. Carlo intervenes, shielding Jonnie from the machine's blue beam and revealing its purpose. Despite concerns raised by Heywood, Jonnie resolves to delve deeper into their situation using the machine.
- Jonnie and the other man-animals confront Terl in the supply closet. Terl reveals his plans to terminate the operation and cover their tracks, but Jonnie threatens to expose the Psychlos' plans if he harms Mickey. The scene ends with Terl deciding to show Jonnie a thing or two, leaving the audience in suspense about what will happen next.
- Terl leads a captive Jonnie into the Denver Library, mocking her search for help. Despite his taunts, Jonnie remains defiant, tearing books from the shelves as Terl observes with eerie amusement.
- Trapped in the cargo cage, Mickey and Heywood fear their fate. Terl learns of Jonnie's discovery of the Declaration of Independence in the library. Deciding to relocate the group, Terl warns against escape and demonstrates his deadly shooting abilities by killing cows.
- A tense encounter between ruthless hunter Terl and compassionate Jonnie unfolds as a grizzly bear attacks. Jonnie's refusal to kill the disarmed Terl triggers a debate. Carlo's pessimism clashes with Jonnie's optimism, who urges the group to learn and fight against unknown monsters. Reluctantly, they agree to return to the mining camp, united in their resolve to confront the future.
- Terl, a powerful alien, reveals the superiority of his planet, Pf'ychlo, and threatens to kill Chrissy if Jonnie disobeys him. Jonnie, understanding the futility of resistance, reluctantly concedes. Terl demonstrates his control by attaching a choke-collar to Chrissy's neck, leaving Jonnie with the chilling realization of his powerlessness.
- Ker detonates the explosive in Heywood's collar, killing him. Terl grants Jonnie's request to spare Heywood after she agrees to never ask for anything else again. Jonnie confirms that Terl wants to know which twin tried to stab him, and Sammy sacrifices himself to protect Mickey. Terl teleports Sammy to the Psychlo home planet, where he dies due to the immense gravitational pull. Terl shows Jonnie a monitor displaying images of teleportation platforms on the Psychlo home planet and explains that this is what will happen to anyone who disobeys him.
- In a haunting scene, Jonnie is forced to witness the gruesome torture and death of an individual, while Terl revels in his suffering. Ker, torn between loyalty and grief, expresses relief that his cousin was punished for withholding information about a mutiny attempt. Terl reveals the chilling fact that conversations are covertly recorded on remote planets, implying severe consequences for those who fail to report any hint of rebellion. Mickey learns the fate of his brother, while Terl's secretive and manipulative nature remains a constant threat. As Terl enters a hidden location, the scene ends on a note of suspense and trepidation, leaving viewers with an unsettling sense of dread.
- Terl presents the Planetship with evidence of the Assistant Planetship's mutiny plot, including a recording of him conspiring to bomb the Planetship's door. The Planetship orders the Assistant Planetship to open the door, and the resulting explosion kills him and destroys the hall.
- Terl and Ker celebrate their victory while Jonnie struggles with despair. Carlo and Mickey remind Jonnie of their need for him, and the scene ends with a voice pledging support.
- The scene begins as news of Jonnie's linguistic abilities spreads, igniting hope among the caged humans. Inside the security headquarters, Jonnie practices on a simulator while Terl gloats over his advantage. Back in the cage, Jonnie teaches the humans to read and write. In the Planetship's office, Terl and Ker confront him with evidence of financial mismanagement, threatening to vaporize him unless he cooperates. The Planetship is coerced into signing blank requisition forms, granting Terl and Ker control over planetary operations.
- Terl and Teri discuss the strange mining equipment requisition and the order to train man-animals to mine. Jonnie pilots the aircraft carrying the men and equipment to a remote area, followed by Ker in a fighter plane. Terl threatens Jonnie to return with half the cargo cage full of gold in fourteen days or face termination. A wild-eyed rogue emerges from the wilderness and asks Jonnie how he made the drone go away without killing him. Jonnie and the men welcome the rogue, named Mason, into their group.
- Jonnie's team, joined by Mason, splits into groups to gather supplies: weapons, building materials, and equipment. Jonnie, inspiring his men, rebuilds a generator, powering battery rechargers. They also create mannequins to appear as working miners. Terl and Ur discuss their ambitions. The discovery of a map indicating potential uranium sites reveals a grim reality about health risks. The team faces a time constraint and resource limitations. Jonnie must allocate resources effectively and motivate his men. The discovery of uranium poses a threat to their people's health.
- Jonnie and his team infiltrate Fort Knox to retrieve gold, but an avalanche blocks their exit. Jonnie creates an air hole, providing oxygen to trapped miners. Despite losing the gold, they successfully rescue the miners, including Jonnie.
- Jonnie unveils the smelted gold bars to Terl, impressing him but also raising suspicion. Terl confirms their authenticity, adjusting the schedule and demanding the remaining gold within seven days. At their cave hideout, Jonnie reveals his plan to retake their planet. Carlo will demolish the monster-guarded dome, allowing the team to infiltrate and ambush the monsters. Jonnie cautions that the assault will trigger a stage-2 alarm, alerting the monsters' home planet, demanding they destroy it before the alarm escalates. The group accepts Jonnie's plan, preparing for the impending battle.
- Jonnie and Carlo dismantle a nuclear warhead, Mickey volunteers to detonate it on the Psychlos' planet, and Terl prepares coffins to hide gold. Mickey's request creates conflict with Jonnie, who agrees despite his hesitation. Ker confronts Jonnie about a recording, and the scene ends with Ker demanding the disc from Jonnie, who refuses to give it to him.
- At the Denver Zoo, Jonnie and Ker meet at Chrissy's cage. Chrissy gives Jonnie a disc, which Ker demands. Jonnie and Chrissy outsmart Ker by passing the disc from cage to cage. Ker proposes a trade, eventually exchanging Chrissy's explosive collar for the disc. Jonnie then offers a second disc for the key to Chrissy's cage. After Ker leaves, Jonnie gives Chrissy the key, and they talk about their future. Chrissy agrees to marry Jonnie, and they embrace, knowing it may be their last time together.
- Terl discovers Ker's plot to blackmail him and outsmarts him, leading to Ker's demise.
- Guards at the Denver Zoo discover empty man-animal cages, prompting a search for escaped humans. Psychlos respond and attempt to round them up. Jonnie and Mason strategize to eliminate the remaining Psychlos at the teleportation platform and latrine.
- Jonnie eliminates a Psychlo attempting to call for reinforcements, triggering an alarm at their HQ. Mickey notices armed Psychlos approaching the teleportation platform. Jonnie provides first aid to Mason while they seek refuge in the control bunker. Carlo sets explosives near the dome's apex before facing an attack from a Psychlocraft.
- Jonnie and Mickey fight off Psychlo Guards and activate the teleportation sequence, but Terl arrives and holds them at gunpoint. The Psychlos open fire, and Chrissy fights back. Carlo attempts to destroy the dome, but fails.
- After the aircraft explodes, shattering the dome, Chrissy is trapped and under fire from Psychlos, but is saved by pieces of glass from the dome. Terl calmly puts on a breath-mask and orders his men to eradicate the humans. Jonnie's men ambush the second wave of Psychlos, while Terl loads his gold onto the teleportation platform. Terl threatens Jonnie, but Jonnie plans to let him start the teleportation sequence so that Mickey can escape with the nuclear weapon. Terl initiates the teleportation sequence, setting the countdown to his own death.
- Jonnie and Terl engage in a fierce battle on the teleportation platform. Jonnie attempts to distract Terl while Mickey retrieves the nuclear warhead. However, Terl, unaware of their plan, activates the explosive collar on Chrissy's shoulder. In a twist of fate, the collar was attached to Jonnie instead, resulting in Terl's self-inflicted injury. Seizing the opportunity, Jonnie grabs the blaster-gun and confronts Terl.
- Mickey's heroic sacrifice destroys the Psychlo planet, ending the conflict but leaving behind devastation. On Earth, Jonnie and his allies initiate diplomatic efforts and confront Terl, who agrees to assist in preventing future bloodshed.
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Character Terl
Description Terl's sudden shift from sadistic and cruel to almost friendly and offering deals when facing death from the bear seems out of character and driven by plot convenience.
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Character Jonnie
Description Jonnie's decision to save Terl from the bear contradicts his previous determination and resourcefulness, especially considering the atrocities he witnessed. It feels forced to keep Terl alive for the plot.
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Description The Psychlos' ability to breathe Earth's atmosphere is inconsistent. They seem to require breathing apparatuses outside the dome but are shown enjoying the fresh air within the dome.
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Description The ease with which Jonnie and his team extract a large amount of gold from Fort Knox seems unrealistic and convenient for the plot.
( Scene 33 )
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Description The absence of Appendix A in the nuclear warhead manual is a convenient plot device to create tension and danger but feels contrived.
( Scene 34 )
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Description Terl's explanation of the Psychlos' history and power feels overly expository and unnatural in the context of the scene.
( Scene 24 )
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Element Scenes of Jonnie learning on the Psychlo learning machine
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Element Scenes of Terl emphasizing leverage
( Scene 23 Scene 25 Scene 29 )
Suggestion Terl's obsession with leverage could be conveyed more subtly to avoid repetition and overemphasis.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
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Jonnie | Jonnie starts as a young and impulsive survivor challenging tradition and seeking exploration. Throughout the screenplay, he grows into a brave and determined leader, willing to make sacrifices for the greater good. He shows resilience, adaptability, and a strong sense of justice, inspiring others to follow his lead and fight back against the oppressive Psychlos. By the end, Jonnie becomes a strategic and selfless leader, driving the rebellion towards victory and freedom. | The character arc for Jonnie is well-developed, showing growth and transformation from a young survivor to a courageous leader. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and emotional journey throughout the screenplay. Jonnie's evolution could be further enhanced by exploring his vulnerabilities, fears, and personal conflicts, making his character more relatable and multidimensional. | To improve Jonnie's character arc, consider incorporating more moments of introspection and emotional turmoil as he navigates the challenges and sacrifices of leading a rebellion. Show his internal conflicts and doubts, as well as his moments of vulnerability and growth. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters in more depth, highlighting how they influence his decisions and shape his development as a leader. |
Chrissy | Chrissy starts off as a brave and resourceful young woman who shows resilience and determination in the face of danger. As the story progresses, she learns to balance her bravery with compassion and hope, willing to fight for a better future for her tribe and family. Through her deep connection with Jonnie, Chrissy discovers the true meaning of sacrifice and justice, ultimately becoming a symbol of strength and compassion for her community. | The character arc for Chrissy is well-developed, showcasing her growth from a strong and independent individual to a compassionate and hopeful leader. However, there could be more emphasis on her internal struggles and conflicts to add depth to her character development. | To improve the character arc for Chrissy, consider adding more scenes that delve into her inner turmoil and the challenges she faces in balancing her bravery with compassion. Show moments of vulnerability and self-doubt to make her journey more relatable and compelling for the audience. Additionally, explore her relationship with other characters to further highlight her growth and transformation throughout the story. |
Carlo | Carlo starts off as a cautious and intense survivor, focused on safety and protection. As the story progresses, he evolves into a more supportive and empathetic companion, willing to take risks for the group's greater good. He ultimately becomes a key player in the team, providing valuable insights and technical expertise to overcome challenges. | The character arc for Carlo is well-developed, showing growth and evolution throughout the story. However, there could be more emphasis on his personal struggles and internal conflicts to add depth to his character. Additionally, exploring his backstory and motivations further could enhance the audience's connection to Carlo. | To improve Carlo's character arc, consider incorporating flashbacks or dialogue that delves into his past experiences and traumas. This can help explain his cautious nature and provide a deeper understanding of his motivations. Additionally, adding moments of vulnerability or moral dilemmas for Carlo to navigate can create a more complex and relatable character. |
Rock | Rock starts off as a no-nonsense individual who is confident in his abilities to handle danger. However, when faced with a monstrous threat, he is forced to confront his own vulnerabilities and fears. Through the course of the story, he learns to embrace his emotions and rely on others for help, ultimately finding strength in his vulnerability and forming deeper connections with those around him. | The character arc for Rock is well-developed and allows for growth and change throughout the story. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal struggles and emotional journey to make his transformation more impactful. Additionally, providing more backstory or depth to his character could enhance the audience's connection to him. | To improve the character arc, consider adding flashback scenes or moments of introspection where Rock reflects on his past experiences that have shaped his no-nonsense attitude. This can help the audience understand his motivations and fears more deeply. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth can add layers to his development and make his transformation more compelling. |
Terl | Terl starts off as a powerful and intimidating antagonist, using his intelligence and authority to control the human characters. However, as the story progresses, he begins to face challenges and setbacks that reveal his vulnerabilities and fears. This leads to a moment of reckoning where he must confront the consequences of his actions and ultimately meet his downfall, either through defeat or redemption. | While Terl is a compelling antagonist with a strong presence, his character arc could benefit from more depth and complexity. By exploring his vulnerabilities and motivations in greater detail, the audience can better understand his actions and possibly even empathize with him. Additionally, providing more opportunities for Terl to interact with the human characters on a deeper level could add layers to his character and create more dynamic relationships. | To improve Terl's character arc, consider adding flashback scenes or moments of introspection that delve into his past experiences and traumas, shedding light on what drives his ruthless behavior. Allow for more nuanced interactions between Terl and the human characters, showcasing different facets of his personality and potentially creating moments of empathy or conflict. Finally, consider giving Terl a more complex and satisfying resolution to his arc, whether through redemption, downfall, or a combination of both. |
Ker | Ker starts as a subordinate eager to climb the ranks, but as he becomes entangled in Terl's manipulation, he transforms into a manipulative and ruthless character seeking power. However, his downfall comes when he becomes a victim of betrayal, leading to a significant character change from a position of power to a desperate and fearful individual. | The character arc for Ker is well-developed, showcasing a clear transformation from a naive subordinate to a manipulative and ruthless individual. However, the transition from ruthless to victim could be further explored to provide a deeper emotional impact on the audience. | To improve the character arc, consider adding more scenes that highlight Ker's descent into ruthlessness and the consequences of his actions. Show his internal struggle more prominently as he grapples with his loyalty to Terl and his own self-preservation. Additionally, provide moments of vulnerability to make Ker a more complex and relatable character for the audience to empathize with. |
Mickey | Mickey starts off as a fearful and cautious individual, struggling to cope with the brutality of the Psychlos. However, as he witnesses the oppression and injustice around him, he transforms into a fierce and determined fighter, willing to take risks and sacrifice himself for the cause. By the end of the screenplay, Mickey emerges as a loyal and brave ally, showing resilience, quick thinking, and unwavering dedication to the mission. | The character arc for Mickey is well-developed, showcasing a clear transformation from a fearful individual to a brave and determined ally. However, to enhance the arc further, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into Mickey's internal struggles and doubts, providing more insight into his emotional journey and growth throughout the feature. | To improve the character arc for Mickey, consider incorporating more moments of internal conflict and self-reflection to highlight his evolution from fear to courage. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters in more depth to showcase how they influence his transformation. By adding layers to Mickey's character development, the audience will be more invested in his journey and ultimate transformation. |
Mason | Mason starts off as a mysterious and enigmatic rogue, joining Jonnie's group with a sense of unpredictability. As he becomes more involved in the rebellion, he begins to show loyalty and courage, willing to fight against the oppressive Psychlos despite the risks. Through his journey, he learns to trust others and embrace his role as a key ally in the fight for freedom. | The character arc for Mason is well-developed, showing a clear progression from a mysterious outsider to a loyal ally. However, there could be more depth added to his backstory to further explain his dark past and motivations. Additionally, his speaking style could be more consistent throughout the screenplay to enhance his enigmatic nature. | To improve the character arc, consider adding flashback scenes or dialogue that delve deeper into Mason's past, providing more insight into his motivations and inner struggles. Additionally, ensure that his speaking style remains consistent to maintain his enigmatic and mysterious persona throughout the feature. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Resistance | The film depicts the humans' struggle against oppression, exploitation, and the threat of annihilation, as well as their determination to fight back and regain their freedom. | This theme is central to the film's plot and character development, as the human characters must overcome fear, doubt, and adversity to achieve their goals. | ||||||||||||
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Human resilience and adaptability | The film shows how the human characters adapt to their new environment and find ways to survive and even thrive despite the challenges they face. | This theme is explored through the characters' resourcefulness, ingenuity, and ability to form alliances with other humans. | ||||||||||||
The importance of unity | The humans must set aside their differences and work together if they are to succeed in their fight against the aliens. | This theme is emphasized through the characters' relationships with each other and their ability to overcome obstacles by working together. | ||||||||||||
Defiance of authority | The human characters must defy their oppressors and fight for their freedom. | This theme is explored through the characters' refusal to accept their fate and their determination to fight for what they believe in. | ||||||||||||
The power of love | The human characters find strength and support in their relationships with each other. | This theme is explored through the characters' romantic relationships, friendships, and family bonds. | ||||||||||||
The importance of sacrifice | The human characters must be willing to sacrifice for the greater good. | This theme is explored through the characters' willingness to put their own lives on the line to save others. | ||||||||||||
The dangers of technology | The alien technology is powerful and dangerous, and the humans must learn to use it responsibly. | This theme is explored through the characters' encounters with the alien technology and the consequences of their actions. | ||||||||||||
The importance of hope | The human characters never give up on their dream of freedom. | This theme is explored through the characters' determination to fight on, even when the odds seem insurmountable. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals focused on survival, resistance against oppression, and learning to outsmart the Psychlos. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals revolved around escaping, fighting back against the Psychlos, and securing the safety of his people. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the values of freedom, justice, and empowerment versus oppression, control, and exploitation. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals drive his growth from a reluctant survivor to a determined rebel leading a revolution. The philosophical conflict challenges his beliefs and values, reshaping his choices and actions.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The evolution of internal and external goals creates a dynamic and engaging narrative structure, building tension and driving the protagonist's journey towards climax. The philosophical conflict adds depth and complexity to the storyline.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The exploration of themes such as freedom, justice, empowerment, oppression, and control adds layers of thematic depth to the screenplay, highlighting the struggles of individuals against oppressive systems and the importance of resilience and resistance.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Preparing for the Unknown | Reverent, Defiant, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Jonnie's Farewell and Journey | Tense, Emotional, Exciting | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Encounter in the Mall | Suspenseful, Menacing, Mysterious, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Escape from the Roof | Intense, Suspenseful, Terrifying, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
5 - Capture and Transport | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Thrilling | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Jonnie's Escape | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | |
7 - Arrival at the Denver Mining Site | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Branding and Rebellion | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful, Violent | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
9 - Resistance Amidst Oppression | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful, Violent | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Betrayal and Manipulation | Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Tense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
11 - The Riderless Horse | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Dark | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Escape and Intrigue | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Terl's Manipulation: Framing Ker | Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Intriguing | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
14 - Leverage and Control | Suspenseful, Intense, Dark, Foreboding | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Escape to the Abandoned Ski Chalet | Intense, Suspenseful, Dark | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
16 - Desperation on the Mountain | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Violent | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
17 - Terl's Deception | Suspenseful, Intense, Deceptive, Conspiratorial | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
18 - Capture and Painting | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Dark | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
19 - Learning Machine Encounter | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
20 - Confrontation in the Supply Closet | Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - Terl's Library Tour | Menacing, Amused, Ominous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Preparing for Relocation | Dark, Intense, Violent | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Confrontation in the Field | Tense, Intense, Dramatic, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
24 - Terl's Warning | Intense, Suspenseful, Menacing | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
25 - The Sacrifice | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Terrifying Torture and a Secret Agenda | Dark, Intense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Assistant Planetship's Treachery Uncovered | Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense, Dark | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Victory and Peril | Tense, Desperate, Resigned, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Whispers of Resistance | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Dangerous Mission | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Preparing for Revolt | Intense, Serious, Hopeful, Grim | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Rescue at Fort Knox | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
33 - The Plan to Retake the Planet | Intense, Determined, Suspenseful, Hopeful | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Preparations for the Final Mission | Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Dark | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - The Trade | Tense, Hopeful, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Terl's Revenge | Suspenseful, Intense, Dark, Dramatic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Escape from the Zoo | Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Violent | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | |
38 - Rebel Ambush and Counterattack | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Confrontation at the Teleportation Field | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - The Shattered Dome | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - The Final Showdown | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Sacrifice and Redemption | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Hopeful | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 |
- Physical environment: The world depicted in the screenplay is one of vast and diverse landscapes, ranging from barren, mountainous regions to futuristic metropolises. The natural elements, such as storms, danger, and isolation, contribute to the harsh and unforgiving nature of the world, while the presence of Psychlo technology and structures adds a sense of oppression and control. Overall, the physical environment plays a crucial role in shaping the characters' experiences and actions, as they navigate the challenges and threats posed by their surroundings.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay highlight themes of survival, resistance, and the clash between different worldviews. The indigenous tribes depicted in the earlier scenes exhibit a deep reverence for their gods and a close connection to nature, while the Psychlos represent an advanced alien culture that exploits and oppresses humans. This cultural divide leads to tension, conflict, and a struggle for identity and autonomy.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is characterized by hierarchy and oppression. The Psychlos, with their advanced technology and superior power, exert control over the human population, reducing them to the status of slaves and 'man-animals.' The screenplay explores the consequences of such a society, including the dehumanization of individuals, the erosion of freedom, and the rise of resistance movements.
- Technology: The screenplay features a blend of primitive and futuristic technologies. The indigenous tribes use animal skins, kill-clubs, and limited resources, while the Psychlos possess advanced weapons, mining equipment, and teleportation devices. This contrast highlights the power dynamics between the two cultures and the ways in which technology can be used as a tool of control and exploitation. However, the screenplay also shows that indigenous knowledge and resourcefulness can be valuable in overcoming technological superiority.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology in the screenplay shape the characters' experiences and actions in profound ways. The harsh and unforgiving environment tests their resilience and forces them to adapt and survive. The cultural divide between humans and Psychlos creates conflicts and challenges their sense of identity and belonging. The oppressive social structure forces them to navigate power dynamics and resist authority. The presence of advanced technology influences their choices and strategies, as they must learn to harness or overcome its effects. Ultimately, the characters' experiences and actions are driven by the interplay of these world elements.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the narrative by providing a backdrop for the characters' journey and the unfolding of events. The vast and dangerous landscapes create obstacles and challenges that the characters must overcome. The cultural differences and societal conflicts generate tension, conflict, and drama. The presence of advanced technology introduces elements of suspense and action, as the characters engage with or resist its effects. The world elements thus play an integral role in driving the narrative forward and shaping the characters' experiences and choices.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring ideas such as the struggle for freedom, the consequences of oppression, the power of resistance, and the resilience of the human spirit. The physical environment, with its harsh conditions and unforgiving nature, serves as a metaphor for the challenges faced by the characters in their fight for liberation. The cultural divide highlights the dangers of prejudice, discrimination, and the dehumanization of others. The oppressive social structure examines the corrupting nature of power and its impact on individuals and society. The presence of advanced technology raises questions about the ethical use of knowledge and the balance between progress and human values. Through these elements, the screenplay delves into complex and thought-provoking themes, adding depth and resonance to the narrative.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by vivid descriptions, a focus on internal and external challenges, and thoughtful dialogue that drives the narrative forward. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by immersing the reader in the setting, developing the characters' depth, and creating a compelling and thought-provoking story. |
Best Representation Scene | 21 - Terl's Library Tour |
Best Scene Explanation | Scene 21 effectively showcases the writer's voice through its evocative descriptions of the Denver Public Library, where Jonnie and Terl engage in a tense encounter. The dialogue is sharp and thought-provoking, highlighting Jonnie's determination and Terl's manipulative nature. The scene also serves as a turning point in Jonnie's journey, as he must confront the harsh realities of the Psychlo occupation and make difficult choices to survive. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Tense and suspenseful scenes often have high emotional impact and drive the story forward | Scenes with a tense and suspenseful tone tend to have higher scores in emotional impact and move the story forward more effectively. |
Scenes with intense action and conflict tend to have higher overall grades | Scenes that feature intense action sequences and dramatic conflict tend to receive higher overall grades than those without. |
Scenes with character changes are often more impactful and memorable | Scenes that include significant character changes or developments tend to have higher scores in emotional impact and overall grade. |
Scenes with a dark and ominous tone tend to have lower character scores | Scenes with a dark and menacing tone often have lower scores in character development, suggesting that the focus shifts away from character interactions. |
Scenes with high stakes and dramatic tension tend to have higher scores in plot and concept | Scenes that raise the stakes and create a sense of urgency tend to have higher scores in plot and concept, indicating that they contribute more to the overall narrative. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The analyzed scenes demonstrate solid writing skills and a clear storytelling voice. The writer effectively uses dialogue, action, and descriptions to convey tension, conflict, and character development. However, there is room for improvement in terms of pacing, structure, and thematic depth.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Read 'Save the Cat! Writes a Novel' by Jessica Brody | This book provides practical advice and exercises for developing compelling characters, refining plot structure, and elevating the quality of storytelling. |
Screenplay | Study screenplays by Aaron Sorkin, known for his sharp dialogue and engaging character dynamics. | Analyzing Sorkin's work can enhance the writer's skills in creating memorable dialogue, building tension, and exploring complex relationships. |
Video | Watch behind-the-scenes documentaries about films with strong world-building elements. | Understanding the process of creating immersive and believable worlds through visual storytelling can inspire the writer to develop more vivid and imaginative settings. |
Exercise | Practice writing scenes from different character perspectives to develop empathy and understanding of diverse motivations.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise encourages the writer to step outside their own perspective and explore the complexities of different characters. |
Exercise | Identify themes in existing screenplays and analyze how they are woven into the narrative.Practice In SceneProv | This practice sharpens the writer's ability to recognize and incorporate thematic elements into their own work. |
Exercise | Write a short story or scene that explores a specific social or ethical issue.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise challenges the writer to think critically about real-world issues and find creative ways to explore them through storytelling. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Chosen One | Jonnie is chosen by the gods to lead the fight against the monsters. | The Chosen One is a character who is destined to save the world from some great evil. This character is often born with special powers or abilities that make them uniquely suited for this task. Examples of the Chosen One trope include Harry Potter, Neo from The Matrix, and Luke Skywalker from Star Wars. |
Forbidden Love | Jonnie and Chrissy are in love, but their relationship is forbidden by the gods. | Forbidden love is a story where two characters are in love with each other, but their relationship is forbidden by society, religion, or family. Examples of forbidden love tropes include Romeo and Juliet, West Side Story, and Titanic. |
Hero's Journey | Jonnie's story follows the classic Hero's Journey, in which he must overcome obstacles and challenges to achieve his goal. | The Hero's Journey is a narrative structure that follows a hero as they go on a journey to achieve a goal. The journey typically involves overcoming obstacles and challenges, and often results in the hero becoming a better person. Examples of the Hero's Journey trope include The Odyssey, Star Wars, and The Lord of the Rings. |
Last Stand | Jonnie and his followers make a last stand against the monsters in the final battle. | The Last Stand is a story where a group of heroes make a final stand against an overwhelming force. The heroes are typically outnumbered and outmatched, but they fight bravely to the end. Examples of the Last Stand trope include The Battle of Thermopylae, The Alamo, and The Battle of Gettysburg. |
Mentor | Parsonstaffer is Jonnie's mentor and guide. | The Mentor is a character who provides guidance and support to the hero. The Mentor can be a wise old man, a powerful wizard, or a skilled warrior. Examples of the Mentor trope include Gandalf from The Lord of the Rings, Obi-Wan Kenobi from Star Wars, and Dumbledore from Harry Potter. |
Prophecy | The gods have prophesied that Jonnie will be the one to lead the fight against the monsters. | Prophecy is a story where a prophecy foretells the future. The prophecy can be about a specific person, event, or object. Examples of the Prophecy trope include The Oracle of Delphi, The Book of Revelation, and The Matrix. |
Redemption | Terl is a villain who eventually redeems himself by helping Jonnie to defeat the monsters. | Redemption is a story where a villain or anti-hero turns away from their evil ways and chooses to do good. Examples of the Redemption trope include Darth Vader from Star Wars, The Joker from The Dark Knight, and Magneto from X-Men. |
Sacrifice | Mickey sacrifices himself to detonate the nuclear weapon on the Psychlos' home planet. | Sacrifice is a story where a character gives up something of value for the greater good. The sacrifice can be a life, a limb, or even a cherished object. Examples of the Sacrifice trope include The Death of Socrates, The Sacrifice of Isaac, and The Crucifixion of Jesus. |
Superhuman Abilities | Jonnie and the other humans develop superhuman abilities after they are exposed to the monsters' technology. | Superhuman Abilities is a trope where a character has abilities that are beyond the normal human range. These abilities can include super strength, super speed, or the ability to fly. Examples of the Superhuman Abilities trope include Superman, The Hulk, and Wolverine. |
Technology Gap | The humans are at a technological disadvantage compared to the monsters. | Technology Gap is a trope where one group of people is more technologically advanced than another. This can create conflict between the two groups, as the more advanced group may try to use their technology to dominate the less advanced group. Examples of the Technology Gap trope include The Martian, Avatar, and The Matrix. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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1 | Jonnie: Save you ever seen a monster? |
7 | District Manager Zete: We'll be doing the universe a favor by exterminating the whole lot of them once we finish mining-out their miserable little planet. |
24 | Terl: There is no way a species as primitive as yours could defeat us. |
25 | Terl: Stupid humans. |
42 | Mickey: I know I'm going to die. But so are you. |
Some Loglines to consider:
A young man leads a rebellion against an oppressive alien force, using their own technology to fight for the survival of humanity. |
In a post-apocalyptic world, a group of human slaves must overcome their differences and learn to trust each other if they are to defeat their alien overlords. |
A brilliant but ruthless alien security chief finds his plans for personal gain disrupted by a group of defiant humans who refuse to be subjugated. |
A journey of discovery and self-belief as a young man transforms from a simple hunter into the leader of a revolution that will determine the fate of Earth. |
A race against time as a group of humans must outsmart their technologically superior alien captors and prevent the complete annihilation of their species. |
In a post-apocalyptic world where humanity has been subjugated by an alien race known as the Psychlos, a young man named Jonnie embarks on a daring mission to not only free his people, but to strike at the heart of the Psychlo empire and reclaim their planet. |
Centuries after a devastating alien invasion, a small band of human survivors must overcome their own fear and mistrust to mount a desperate, last-ditch effort to reclaim their planet and secure their freedom from the technologically superior Psychlo conquerors. |
When a young man discovers the truth about his people's history and the nature of the alien overlords that have subjugated them, he must lead a ragtag resistance movement in a high-stakes battle for the fate of humanity. |
In a future where humanity has been reduced to a subjugated class, one man's quest for knowledge becomes the catalyst for a bold uprising against the alien Psychlo empire that threatens to eradicate the last vestiges of human civilization. |
A post-apocalyptic sci-fi thriller that follows the journey of a young man who must navigate the treacherous world of Psychlo occupation, uncover the secrets of his people's past, and spearhead a desperate rebellion to reclaim their planet and secure the future of humanity. |
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Explanation: Battlefield Earth presents a captivating sci-fi premise with a strong central character arc and exciting action sequences. However, the screenplay suffers from uneven pacing, underdeveloped characters, and excessive violence. With revisions to address these issues and explore the story's themes and world-building in greater depth, the screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and thought-provoking film.
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Battlefield Earth' is a well-crafted and ambitious science fiction story that effectively blends action, character development, and thematic exploration. The worldbuilding is strong, the protagonist's journey is compelling, and the resistance effort against the Psychlo occupation is thoughtfully conceived and executed. While there are a few areas that could use some refinement, the screenplay as a whole is a compelling and engaging read that is worthy of recommendation.