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EXT. MACKAY APARTMENT PARKING LOT - NIGHT The roar of the Houston streets overlay the small movements of the residents, moving throughout the apartment parking lot. The stillness is broken by the agitated voice of a mother.
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INT. CUSTOMER HOME GARAGE - DAY Under the hood of the older model chevy, work weathered hands tighten down the alternator belt, fastens down sparkplugs, snaps on new wires over top the plug, spray cleans inside and out of the carburetor.
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EXT/INT. REPAIR SHOP GARAGE ALLEY - DAY Amari navigates his Dodge Grand Caravan into the narrow alley. He steps out of his vehicle, he's greeted by Reid, (20s) a twin, tall, handsome with bright green eyes and reddish hair, and his twin brother Grein, (20s), green eyes,
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EXT. HOUSTON DOWNTOWN - DAY The downtown Houston air is filled with laughter and noise. Families enjoy themselves at Discovery Green, whizzing by teens cruise through the busy streets on scooters, through bayou pathways.
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INT. NIKKI'S CAR - DAY Amari climbs inside the small car, Nikki hits the gas, the little car moves at a high rate of speed, flashing past parked cars. AMARI
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INT. LUXURIOUS HOME - CONTINUOUS Amari, Leo, and Rip slowly roll past a lavish home. The garage door is open. AMARI (surprised)
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EXT. HOUSTON STREETS - NIGHT Amari stumbles into a dimly lit bus stop, clutching his neck. His breathing is labored, his face distorted with fear and pain. Blood has painted his white shirt Reid. The bus stops in front of the sign, the doors open, and
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EXT. HOUSTON MEDICAL CENTER STREET - DAY Amari shields his eyes from the sun. The sounds of the busy streets overload his ears. His nose is engulfed with the smell of trash, piss, and body odors of those approaching and around him.
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INT. FLASHBACK AMARI’S HOME AGE 8 - DAY A young AMARI, 11 years old, sits on the worn-out couch, his eyes fixed on the television screen. Voices and laughter blare from the television. Amari’s face lights up with amusement.
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EXT/INT. ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY Amari walks Javier into the school, the brothers exchange their signature handshake before Javier heads inside. Amari watches him disappear through the school doors before turning away.
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INT. GARAGE - LATER Amari works alone in the shop. Amari tosses a treat at front of closet door. Destroyer barks inside the dark closet. Amari reaches inside for him, the Destroyer scatters off, toward the suspended car. The Destroyer runs over under the
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INT. AMARI’S APARTMENT - NIGHT Back at the apartment, Amari tucks Javier into bed. JAVIER (curiously) Amari, if a monkey threw poop at
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INT. CAR DELIEVERY FLASHBACK - NIGHT Lost, Amari speeds through the city streets, reading the address on his phone. Unconsciously, he reaches into the McDonald's bag, takes a handful of fries, and stuffs them in his mouth.
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INT. CITY STREET - DAY Amari, disheveled, runs past a half-naked HOMELESS MAN who cries out desperately. NAMELESS HOMELESS MAN My clothes!
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EXT. APARTMENT BUILDING PARKING LOT - DAY Thompson investigates the gruesome crime scene, surrounded by the little boy's grieving family and a crowd of concerned residents. A NEWS CREW arrives, setting up their equipment to report on the double murder.
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INT. CORONER'S OFFICE - DAY The CORONER, (60s) with a scientific demeanor, points to the gruesome bite and rip marks on the autopsy table. CORONER Detective, these bite and rip marks
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EXT. BAR - CONTINUOUS MATEO (19) exits his car, his eyes focus up on the moon. MATEO (YOUNG MAN) Show time. CUT BACK TO:
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EXT. CHAOTIC PARTY SCENE - NIGHT Partygoers scatter in panic, their faces etched with fear and confusion. Emergency lights flash. the air is thick with sirens and panic. FIREFIGHTERS and EMERGENCY TECHS work frantically to tend to
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INT. KESSLER LUXURIOUS HOME BEDROOM - MORNING Amari jolts awake, his heart pounding in his chest. He finds himself in a lavish, unfamiliar bedroom. Panic sets in, and he sits up quickly. The door slowly opens, and Mateo enters the room.
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INT. FLASHBACK LATE 1700S LONDON PRISON - DAY Inside a damp, dimly lit London prison, terrified INMATES scream for the guard. The haunting werewolf howls echo from the basement. 48.
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INT. PRESENT KESSLER'S HOME CHANGE ROOM - DAY Amari sits in awe, struggling to comprehend the astonishing tale that Kessler has just revealed. AMARI (astonished)
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INT/EXT. KESSLER’S HOME - NIGHT AMARI How do I control it? MATEO Lots of practice.
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INT. CITY STREET - NIGHT Amari and Mateo wearing his shiesty mask, walk the neighborhood, they watch elderly woman attempting to get in her car, when a criminal runs up on her quickly, struggling for her car keys.
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INT. AMARI'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS Amari enters through the window, from the corner Mateo eyes glow in the dark. MATEO I can smell the blood under your
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INT. SID’S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS Sid’s nurse rubs soothing cream on his hands, and neck. The nurse gives him a drink and pain pills. NURSE Are the pills working or do we need
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INT. CAGE ROOM - NIGHT Sid enters the cage room. Sable steps out and meets his gaze. SID How's my girl? He gently rubs the scars on her face and head.
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INT. MAKESHIFT CAR REPAIR GARAGE - NIGHT Gino and Tony storm into the garage, their expressions hardened and determined. GINO (gruffly)
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EXT. RANCH - DAY Mateo and Amari stand on the edge of a cliff overlooking a breathtaking lake. The sun shines brightly, casting a golden glow over the scene. MATEO
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EXT. HOUSTON BUNGALOW NEIGHBORHOOD - NIGHT The streets are lit up from the tiny bungalow homes, roars from football games, and the homeowners echo from garages turned man caves. ANGIE
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INT. WASHBURN TUNNEL - NIGHT Midway through the dark tunnel, they slow their run to a strenuous walk. Only heavy breathing, the sound of the damp pavement under their feet, and a small light at the end of the tunnel as the finish line.
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EXT. PRESENT DAY - CONTINUOUS AMARI You miss her? Mateo forcing his tears back. MATEO
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INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY Mrs. Andrews slowly awakens, her eyes fluttering open. Amari grasps her hand and smiles with relief. AMARI (gently)
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EXT. CITY STREETS - NIGHT Amari walks through the desolate city streets. Images of his parents and the little boy flash through his mind. 81. He passes the homeless area, filled with tents, trash, and
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INT. APARTMENT LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Amari peeps through the window, observing the goon sitting with his back to him. Javier looks up and notices Amari’s shadow. Amari takes hold of the door, ready to make his move. Before he can act, a shot rings out from behind. The
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INT. WAREHOUSE LAB - NIGHT Amari lays uncomfortable, tied down to a hospital bed, Sid’s nurse checks his vitals. AMARI You can’t help him do this. He has
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INT. KESSLER HOME - NIGHT Kessler hands shake as he pours himself a drink. His bags still at his feet. Mateo enters the room, his eyes fixed. KESSLER Why are you not in Atlanta? Where’s
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INT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT A spray of gun shots leaves large holes into the walls of the warehouse, cement and wood chips sprinkle the air. Kessler and Mateo rip through goons like butter. Tony drops his gun after Mateo slashes his wrist, blood
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EXT. ROOFTOP - CONTINUOUS Reeves lands gracefully on the rooftop, her werewolf form glistening in the moonlight. She scans the area, her senses heightened. Her eyes fall upon Mateo, who is shot in the shoulder, healing slowly.
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INT. WAREHOUSE LAB - CONTINUOUS Amari searches the room, his eyes filled with concern. AMARI Javier! He spots Javier, hiding nervously under a desk.
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INT. POLICE PRESS CONFERENCE ROOM - DAY Thompson, with a bandaged arm, Reeves, and the Police Chief stand behind a podium. Eager Reporters fill the room. The reporters scribble notes. Reeves steps forward to provide more details.
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INT. HOSPITAL - ICU ROOM - DAY Reid and Grein, still in ICU beds, Amari is seated between them. REID (weakly)
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INT. CAR REPAIR SHOP - DAY Amari, Reid (with a purple eye and one Green), and Grein (now with a brown eye and one Green) are hanging a new flat screen television on the wall. Reeves pulls up in a small, fancy car.

Obsidian Moon

A skilled mechanic with a troubled past must confront his newfound supernatural abilities as a werewolf, navigating the gritty underworld of Houston while protecting his family and seeking redemption.

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This script offers a fresh take on the werewolf genre, blending urban grit and supernatural suspense. It explores the moral complexities of a young man grappling with newfound powers, balancing his desire for a better life with the dark consequences of his transformation. Authentic characters and captivating dialogue ground the fantastical elements in a relatable and compelling narrative, making it a thrilling and thought-provoking experience for viewers who enjoy action, drama, and a dash of the supernatural.

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Story Facts
Genres:
Horror 40% Fantasy 30% Action 25% Crime 20% Drama 35% Thriller 25%

Setting: Present day, Houston, Texas, with scenes set in various locations including a garage shop, a city street, a luxurious house, a hospital, a warehouse, a bar, a shooting range, an animal shelter morgue, a Mexican cartel compound and others

Themes: Transformation, Redemption and Second Chances, Family and Community, Violence and its Consequences, Supernatural and the Unknown, Social Injustice and Inequality, Fear and Paranoia

Conflict & Stakes: Amari's struggle to control her werewolf transformation while protecting her family and uncovering the truth about the mysterious werewolf attacks. Her family's safety and her own sanity are at stake. The overall story is also fueled by the conflict between good and evil, as Amari fights against Sid's corrupting influence and the threat of violence from those seeking to exploit the werewolf abilities for their own gain.

Mood: Dark, suspenseful, and intense, with moments of hope and resilience

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: A female mechanic with a secret werewolf affliction. The story blends elements of action, horror, and fantasy in a unique way, focusing on a strong female lead with supernatural abilities.
  • Plot Twist: Kessler is a centuries-old werewolf with a mysterious past and a hidden agenda. This twist adds depth to the story, introducing a character with a complex history and motivations that drive the plot forward.
  • Distinctive Setting: Houston, Texas. The urban setting provides a grounded contrast to the supernatural elements of the story, adding a sense of realism and depth to the characters' struggles.
  • Genre Blend: Blends elements of action, horror, fantasy, and crime thriller. The combination of these genres creates a unique and engaging experience for the audience.
  • Unique Characters: Amari and Mateo are both complex and compelling characters with relatable struggles and complex emotions. They are not archetypal heroes, making them even more interesting to watch.
  • Innovative Ideas: The film explores the consequences of supernatural powers and the corrupting influence of greed and ambition. It presents a unique perspective on the werewolf mythology, adding a layer of depth and complexity to the story.

Comparable Scripts: Teen Wolf (TV Show), The Originals (TV Show), Underworld (Movie Series), Being Human (TV Show), The Vampire Diaries (TV Show), Bitten (TV Show), Hemlock Grove (TV Show), True Blood (TV Show)

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