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INT. DINGY BEDROOM, EAST BERLIN APARTMENT - NIGHT A young man is unconscious and sprawled out on a bed. This is PETER CULLEN. He’s twenty, sculpted like an Olympian, his face a deceptive blend of charm and mischief. He sits up, methodical, a statue coming to life. His hands
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EXT. ROOF, EAST BERLIN APARTMENT BUILDING - CONTINUOUS He examines the distance of the adjacent building and leaps safely across, straight to the feet of a STASI OFFICER. The jittery officer keeps his gun fixed on Peter. STASI
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EXT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - LATER Peter pretends to be drunk and violently bangs on the door. PETER Let me in! I know my girlfriend is in there!
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EXT. BACK ALLEY, EAST BERLIN BAR - - MOMENTS LATER Peter spots a window leading into a bathroom in the back of the bar. INT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - CONTINUOUS The bar owner answers a ringing phone. He hands it to Trojan.
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EXT. HIGH SCHOOL FOOTBALL FIELD - EVENING Thick snow flakes fall over a roaring CROWD as they watch two MASSACHUSETTS HIGH SCHOOL FOOTBALL TEAMS line up. A hulking quarterback called MIKEY WALSH gets a hiked ball and scrambles behind the clashing OFFENSIVE and DEFENSIVE
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INT. FLANNAGAN’S HOUSE - LATER It’s a rowdy party. Too many drunk teenagers with no adult supervision are spread out in a spacious and upscale suburban home. KITCHEN
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EXT. FLANAGAN'S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Everybody scatters into opposite directions. Peter, Murph and Billy head to the back yard and jump the fence. EXT. SUBURBAN STREET - CONTINUOUS
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INT. POLICE STATION - LATER Peter is alone in a cell. OFFICER DUNPHY Cullen! Daddy just posted bail. EXT. POLICE STATION - MOMENTS LATER
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INT/EXT. CHARLES’S CAR - A COUPLE OF MILES LATER It’s silent and awkward. The typical tension and disappointment filled father/son drive through quiet and barely lit streets. Who’s gonna break first? CHARLES
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INT/EXT. CRASHED CADILLAC - MOMENTS LATER Peter’s unconscious. His face is covered in blood. Charles comes to with a heavy gash on his forehead. Charles checks Peter’s vitals - still alive. He kicks through his window and gets out.
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INT/EXT. CRASHED CADILLAC Peter barely opens one of his eyes. A blurry haze of what seems like his father crawls towards him. The station wagon pulls up to the crash site. A burly MASKED DRIVER and MASKED SNIPER exit.
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INT/EXT. CRASHED CADILLAC - MOMENTS LATER Screeching tires are heard. Peter slowly opens both eyes. His body lies still in the overturned car. He sees Charles’s lifeless body through the window. Sirens sound in the distance. And in the faintest of voices -
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EXT. SUBURBAN HOME - NIGHT (FLASHBACK) A four man BLACK OPS TEAM surrounds a house with a flag of Texas on the front porch. INT/EXT. PARKED CAR - SAME TIME Clark sits in a parked car and surveys them through a scope.
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EXT. SUBURBAN HOME - CONTINUOUS The TEAM LEADER spots a middle aged COUPLE washing dishes through the kitchen window. He orders the TEAM to move in. Moments later, the team covertly breaches a door leading into the kitchen and swiftly takes out the couple with two
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INT. LIVING ROOM, SUBURBAN HOME - MOMENTS LATER The team continues ahead until all the lights go out. TEAM LEADER Hold... Something’s wrong. A SHADOWED ASSASSIN swoops in like a ghost behind TEAM MEMBER
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EXT. NATIONAL MALL - DAY Highland lights his pipe and puffs out some smoke. CLARK Someone cut through my men like scissors on wrapping paper. Men I
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EXT. BUS STATION - DAY Peter slouches on a bench. All that he owns is in two suitcases by his feet. He stares at a FATHER cleaning the melting ice cream off his INFANT SON’S hand. A quick flash of the accident and Charles’s dead body pierce
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INT./EXT. BUS - CONTINUOUS Peter sits by a window and stares out, oblivious to anything around him. Natalia suddenly enters and walks passed Peter to a seat in the back.
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EXT. YALE CAMPUS - LATER Peter stands in front of the large arching campus gate. The impressive stone wall architecture overwhelms him before he takes his first step into a brave new world. 35.
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EXT. EQUITUM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER The building - colonial architectural design stands out with four black obelisk columns by the door way. PETER Jesus...
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INT. DR. HIGHLAND’S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS The hallway is long. The walls decorated with ancient Greek and Japanese art. 43. Something about the environment settles Peter as he continues
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INT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - NIGHT Peter is standing over Trojan’s corpse. The phone on the bar suddenly rings. He hesitates to answer as it continues to ring, until - JOSEPH HIGHLAND (V.O)
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EXT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME The Stasi surround the Bar. INT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME The poison's effect is reaching a painful threshold. JOSEPH HIGHLAND (V.O.)
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EXT. STREETS, EAST BERLIN - LATER Peter dashes through alley after alley as the sirens of the Stasi patrol cars squeal in the streets. An unmarked patrol car cuts him off. He slides over the hood and puts two bullets in the STASI PASSENGER exiting the
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EXT. CHECKPOINT, EAST BERLIN - LATER Peter approaches a car lineup at the border. The GUARD #1 flashes a light into every car before letting them through. Peter’s next. And he’s a little worse for wear with the poison reaching a critical point.
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EXT. STREET, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME Two Stasi find Peter’s victims. INT. BAR, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME Zakharov hears the panicked Stasi over her radio. ZAKHAROV
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EXT. CHECKPOINT, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME He reveals a picture of Trojan. GUARD #2 We were warned about an American. Just making sure.
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INT/EXT. PETER’S CAR - MOMENTS LATER Peter’s in the clear and makes it onto a rural West German highway road. EXT. CHECKPOINT, EAST BERLIN - SAME TIME A car squeals to the border booth. Zakharov jumps out and
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EXT. HIGHWAY ROAD, WEST GERMANY - SOME MILES LATER Peter is barely holding on. His car swerves left and right. The road narrows and his field of view disappears by the second. Headlights illuminate the rear view mirror for a moment but vanish as quickly as they appeared.
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EXT. HIGHWAY ROAD, WEST GERMANY - THE NEXT MORNING Peter wakes up and looks like shit. He opens the case in his lap. It contains a SILVER COLT REVOLVER and a written note - “I looked, and behold, an ashen horse; and he who sat on it had the name Death; and Hades was following with him.” He

Equitum

After the mysterious death of his Congressman father, a young man is recruited into a secretive and powerful organization that may hold the answers to his father's murder.

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Equitum stands out in the espionage genre by focusing not just on the action and intrigue typical of spy narratives, but also on the deep emotional and psychological struggles of its protagonist, Peter Cullen. The incorporation of personal loss and the search for identity amidst a backdrop of Cold War tensions adds layers to the storytelling, making it compelling for audiences who appreciate character-driven narratives alongside thrilling plots.

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Genres:
Action 35% Crime 20% Drama 40% Thriller 45% War 10%

Setting: 1960s, specifically during the Cold War, East Berlin and West Germany

Themes: Identity and Memory Loss, Espionage and Political Intrigue, Family Legacy and Father-Son Relationships, Betrayal and Deception, Survival and Resilience

Conflict & Stakes: Peter's urgent mission to eliminate Trojan while racing against time due to a deadly poison in his system, alongside his internal struggle with his father's death and the quest for vengeance.

Mood: Tense and urgent, with moments of introspection and emotional conflict.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The protagonist is racing against time due to a deadly poison, adding urgency to the narrative.
  • Major Twist: Peter's internal conflict regarding his father's legacy and his quest for vengeance intertwine with the external conflict of espionage.
  • Distinctive Setting: The story is set against the backdrop of Cold War Berlin, providing a rich historical context.
  • Innovative Ideas: The blend of personal revenge with espionage creates a unique narrative that explores both action and emotional depth.

Comparable Scripts: The Bourne Identity, Run Lola Run, The Manchurian Candidate, 24 (TV Series), The Spy Who Came in from the Cold, Memento, John Wick, The American, The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo

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