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1 – EXT. SYRYA – NIGHT We see the pious and leader Godfrey of Bouillon (French, 36), tall, brown haired and robust, sitting by a fire in a crusader military camp, it’s winter. The period is a fictional crusade of the nobles, at the end of the 10 th century. The crusader camp
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3 - INT. JERUSALEM – MORNING King of a kingdom in dread, it is Aladine, Pagan King who is forty years old, he is cruel, short and strong, who is in his throne room with paper, examining his alliances with other Muslims, he is interrupted by a young messenger who enters in
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6 - INT. ROYAL ROOM, JERUSALEM – NIGHT The Muslim king talks to the sorcerer, Ismen (34), in your royal room: ISMEN Your majesty, having abandoned the Christian faith
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7 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – NIGHT Commander Godfrey talks to the Egyptian ambassadors (middle-aged mens) and Argante in his tent: GODFREY I appreciate Egypt's neutrality, but an alliance,
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8 - EXT. DUDÓN’S FUNERAL – NIGHT At night, Dudón's funeral takes place, his body is burned, he is veiled with his armor and a crucifix, the crusaders, like Tancred and Rinaldo, gather in silence around the body, Godfrey pays honors to him and begins to sing a Latin funeral hymn, this
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13 - INT. JERUSALEM – AFTERNOON The knight Argante talks to King Aladine at his dinner table in the castle in Jerusalem, they are both sitting. Argante says: ARGANTE This war could last years, we are dealing
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14 - EXT. JERUSALEM - MORNING At next day, outside the walls of Jerusalem, the Prince Tancred talks to Godfrey a few kilometers away: GODFREY I believe in our God and in your ability, Tancred, to defeat
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16 – INT. PALESTINE’S FOREST – NIGHT Princess Erminia, with trembling hand, she abandons her horse in the forest, sits near a tree and begins to cry, for her unhappy love. Erminia soliloquy: ERMINIA
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18 – INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – MORNING Tancred, walks through the Christian camp, with sadness he remembers Clorinda. Two Christian sentries comment from his side: CHRISTIAN SENTRY
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21 – EXT. JERUSALEM – MORNING Eustace goes towards his brother Godfrey, a few kilometers from the wall of Jerusalem: EUSTACE Brother, no sign of Godfrey, they say he's gone into the woods
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22 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – MORNING The next day, a cavalry of Prince Charles of Denmark, accompanied by troops of 100 knights and a flag holder, arrives at the Christian camp. The prince (30), sensitive and somewhat delirious, but very capable as a soldier, goes towards the
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23 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – NIGHT The Italian knight, Argillano, friend of Rinaldo, cannot sleep, he tosses and turns in bed, and wakes up from his heavy sleep and nightmares: ARGILLANO
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24 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – NIGHT The Furies, female spirits, Nemesis, Alleto, Shrew, and Tisiphone, fly over the sleeping Christian camp, in a dark and hateful manner. They bring the Arab commander with a spell in hand, the tough Suleiman (40 years old), with his troops on the
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26 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP - DAWN Suleiman lays siege to the Christian camp with his men, thousands of Muslims in total, Baldwin with his French troops, and Count Guelfo fight with him, killing a Muslim soldier near the Arab leader, Guelfo says:
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28 - INT. JERUSALEM – AFTERNOON King Aladine, meets with Idraotes the regent of Damascus and the brave Argante, the Turkish Suleiman enters the throne room together with Ismen, where the meeting is taking place and performs ceremony for King Aladine, who says sadly:
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29 – INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – AFTERNOON The 50 Christian soldiers who saved the European army from Suleiman's siege sit in a circle talking to the Christian princes, among them is Tancred who embraces Godfrey: GODFREY
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31 - INT. JERUSALEM – NOON We see the Egyptian troops marching with the savage Argante in the lead, to face the thousands of powerful troops of the Crusaders, the battle that shakes heaven and hell, once again, has begun.
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32 - EXT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – MORNING The Crusaders repair the siege tower outside the Christian camp, to return to the assault. A noisy crowd, far from any sleep or rest. Tancred talk with the eunuch Arsete (old black man), about his problem:
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33 – EXT. JERUSALEM – MORNING Bold Clorinda greed for her fame, says on the walls of Jerusalem, to one of the guards: CLORINDA Guard, call our brave Suleiman and Argante, let them come and
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37 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP - MORNING MONTAGE: In a makeshift Catholic church on the mountain a Christian procession sings Catholic funeral hymns in hill. Tancred remains in his tent, wracked with grief and refusing to get up and do anything, depression weighing him down.
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38 – EXT. CLORINDA’S FUNERAL - AFTERNOON Clorinda's burial takes place, the procession sings a funeral hymn, when the noble warrior is placed in a Christian tomb on the mountain, Tancred says to everyone present: TANCRED
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42 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP - NIGHT We see a mobilization of royal and mercenary troops in Jerusalem, without any fear. Meanwhile, the pious Godfrey talks to the bishop at the Christian camp and says: GODFREY
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43 – EXT. SKY – NIGHT Night falls gentle now upon the crusaders, mother nature rests in a deep, silent rose. On her heavenly throne, Lord Jesus Christ, the King of Kings and lord of lords, is attentive to every disturbance on Earth. With
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44 - INT. PALESTINE FOREST – AFTERNOON Riding at speed, Prince Charles and the knight Ubaldo enter the dense and old Palestinian forest, he and Ubaldo talk about the fights they faced: UBALDO
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45 - INT. ARMIDAS’S CASTLE – TWILIGHT The day dawned, and winter tomorrow is dry but it doesn't stop the dawn from rising triumphantly in the sky. Charles and Ubaldo, slept in the room of Armida's castle, they get up and Ubaldo says to Charles:
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46 - EXT. ISLES OF FORTUNE – MORNING Inside the ship, happy sailors pull the sails, the winter fog leaves the ship and they begin to see what they have dreamed of after so long at sea: a fatal dawn shows two beautiful Greek islands, the Isles of Fortune, which are lands fertile.
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47 – INT. FORTUNE’S PALACE – AFTERNOON The fairy garden is happy, the birds peck at the tree branches, the fruits fall from the trees, the ground looks like crystal, the fairies fly from tree to tree, everything is vibrant and colorful, include the animals. Rinaldo is dressed in a Greek
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48 – INT. FAIRIES GARDEN - NIGHT Armida talks to the fairies in her garden: ARMIDA I should make him pay for this offense, master, make him pay for his contempt.
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50 - EXT. PALESTINE – AFTERNOON Meanwhile, Rinaldo travels on a ship back to Jerusalem, accompanied by Charles and Ubaldo; he is satisfied with his choice, the further away from Armida's dangerous influence he gets. On the same path that made him get lost, the Italian prince
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52 - INT. CHRISTIAN CAMP – NIGHT Rinaldo returns to the camp with his new armor and charged with the spirit of brave men, his heart is crushed by the high demands. Prince Charles, hands over his fatal sword to Rinaldo: CHARLES
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54 – EXT. MOUNT OLIVIER - MORNING The next morning, he climbed Mount Olivier, accompanied by the mist of dawn, knelt down and pray to God, on your knees. RINALDO May God have mercy on my soul, I blessed by the sky
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55 – INT. CHRISTIAM CAMP – MORNING In jubilation, the camp welcomes him back, Rinaldo talks in the center of the camp with the good Godfrey: GODFREY I went, I saw, I overcame the evil forest.
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57 - EXT. JERUSALEM – NIGHT BATTLE OF INVASION’S MONTAGE: In prayer, Godfrey marches at the front of the Crusader army. The pagans are prepared in front of the strong gates of Jerusalem. Raymond leads the attack on the tower from the front, Camillus attacked Jerusalem from behind
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58 – INT. JERUSALEM – NIGHT Prudence or death made the Muslim soldiers run and leave the walls toppled, only the obstinate and strong Argante continues to fight, between the conquered gates. His face is dauntless, not yet frightened by horror.
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59 – INT. JERUSALEM - NIGHT In the city of Jerusalem, in great confusion with the Crusade invasion, with Muslims and Crusaders fighting in the middle of the streets of the holy city, the common people try to sneak into the temples of the city of Christ, away from the blood and
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60 – INT. DAVID TOWER – NIGHT Suleiman tries to encourage the frightened Arab troops, King Aladine is increasingly obstinate in resisting: SULEIMAN The King is safe, and with him alive, our city still lives, we
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63 – INT. EGYPT CAMP – DAWN The wicked Queen Armida, in a lofty throne and beautiful white dress, sits in the Egyptian camp, she talks to Asian knights and their maidens, who are lying on Indian pillows. She says to her companions:
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65 - EXT. PALESTINE – AFTERNOON On the way to Jerusalem, Tancred lies looking like a Christian knight. Vanfrin doesn't recognize him at first, he only notices that Arab soldiers are trying to approach the body. Vanfrin shouts:
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66 – INT. JERUSALEM – NIGHT Vanfrin meets with the good Godfrey and the Christian princes in a square in Jerusalem, with a bonfire in the center, he tells of the evil plans against the commander's life: GODFREY
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68 – INT. JERUSALEM – NOON With very shiny weapons, beautiful helmets and very well armed, the Arab troops give Rinaldo and his Christian soldiers a hard time in front of the Tower of David, led by Suleiman. They receive support from the black soldiers of Ethiopia, who
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69 – INT. JERUSALEM – AFTERNOON The pagan camp suffered irreparable losses and were massacred, but the Christian troops also suffered, one of the Christian knights, Robert, fell prisoner to the sorcerer Adrastes, the losses on both sides are equal in value.
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70 – EXT. JERUSALEM – TWILIGHT At the same time, Godfrey fights with the royal troops of Egypt, who resist outside Jerusalem, in a courageous way, the Christian leader kills the Egyptian leader, Rimideon. Godfrey fights with the royal Egyptian troops, who see the light

JERUSALEM DELIVERED

In the midst of the Crusades, a pious French commander, Godfrey of Bouillon, leads his Christian knights on a quest to reclaim the holy city of Jerusalem from the Saracens, battling political intrigue, supernatural forces, and their own personal demons along the way.

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JERUSALEM DELIVERED stands out for its blend of historical fiction, fantasy, and romance. The screenplay offers a unique perspective on the Crusades, incorporating supernatural elements and complex character relationships. Its exploration of faith, honor, and love against the backdrop of war makes it compelling for audiences interested in epic historical dramas.

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Genres:
War 50% Fantasy 30% Drama 40% Romance 25%

Setting: Late 10th century, Jerusalem and surrounding areas during the Crusades

Themes: Faith and Divine Intervention, Love and Sacrifice, Honor and Duty, Conflict and War, Redemption and Forgiveness, Cultural and Religious Identity

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle between Christian and Muslim forces for control of Jerusalem, with personal stakes involving love, loyalty, and redemption.

Mood: Dramatic and intense, with moments of hope and tragedy.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The intertwining love story between Tancred and Clorinda, set against the backdrop of the Crusades.
  • Major Twist: Clorinda's tragic death at the hands of Tancred, revealing the complexities of love and loyalty.
  • Distinctive Setting: The historical and cultural richness of Jerusalem during the Crusades, providing a visually stunning backdrop.
  • Innovative Ideas: The inclusion of supernatural elements, such as sorcery and divine intervention, adds a unique layer to the narrative.

Comparable Scripts: Kingdom of Heaven, The Last Duel, The Crusades: An Arab Perspective, The Song of Roland, A Knight's Tale, The Witcher (TV Series), The Mists of Avalon, The Iliad, The Witcher: Blood Origin

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