Ghostbusters
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USP: "Ghostbusters" is a supernatural comedy about a group of eccentric scientists who investigate and capture ghosts. The film's unique voice is characterized by its blend of humor, suspense, and action, and its fast-paced storytelling. The characters are well-developed and relatable, and the dialogue is witty and engaging. The film's special effects are also impressive, and they help to create a sense of realism and immersion. The film's themes are universal and timeless, and they resonate with audiences of all ages. "Ghostbusters" is a classic film that is sure to entertain and delight audiences for years to come.
Overview
Genres: Comedy, Horror, Fantasy, Action, Sci-Fi, Science Fiction, Mystery, Thriller, Adventure, Romance
Setting: Present day, New York City
Overview: The screenplay for "Ghostbusters" earns an impressive overall score of 8.3, indicating its strong potential as a commercially successful and critically acclaimed film. This rating reflects the screenplay's compelling blend of comedy, action, and science fiction within a supernatural setting, its well-developed characters, witty dialogue, and engaging plot. However, there are opportunities for further refinement to elevate the story's emotional depth, character development, and narrative complexity.
Themes: The Power of Science and Technology, The Importance of Teamwork, The Supernatural and the Unknown, The Battle Between Good and Evil, The Importance of Humor and Wit
Conflict and Stakes: The Ghostbusters' struggle to save New York City from supernatural threats, while balancing their business and personal lives.
Overall Mood: Humorous and suspenseful
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: The Ghostbusters' first encounter with a ghost is humorous and lighthearted.
- Scene 10: The Ghostbusters' battle with the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man is suspenseful and thrilling.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The Ghostbusters' unique blend of science fiction and comedy
- Plot Twist : The revelation that Dana Barrett is the Gatekeeper
- Distinctive Setting : The dark and supernatural world of New York City
- Innovative Ideas : The Ghostbusters' unique gadgets and weapons
- Unique Characters : The Ghostbusters' quirky and memorable personalities
- Genre Blend : The screenplay's unique blend of science fiction, comedy, and horror
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$25-30 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults and children aged 10 and up, fans of action, comedy, and science fiction
Marketability: The screenplay has a strong comedic hook, compelling characters, and a visually exciting premise that is sure to appeal to a wide audience.
The screenplay has a strong comedic hook, but the story and characters may be too complex for younger audiences.
The screenplay has a strong comedic hook, but the story and characters may be too complex for younger audiences.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide audience and potential for merchandise and sequels
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay's originality stands out with a high percentile of 86.54%, indicating a unique and inventive story.
- The concept of the screenplay is also a strength, ranking at 79.60%, suggesting a well-developed and engaging premise.
- Character development could be enhanced, with a low percentile of 1.6%. Focusing on crafting compelling and relatable characters would elevate the story.
- Emotional impact currently ranks low at 12.4%. Exploring deeper emotional connections and exploring character motivations could intensify the screenplay's resonance.
The percentile patterns suggest an intuitive writing style, with strengths in dialogue (51.6%) and story forward movement (67.89%). This intuitive approach could be complemented by developing more intricate plot structures and concepts.
Balancing Elements- Balancing the low character development percentile with stronger character-driven elements would enhance the emotional impact and overall engagement.
- Consider increasing the pacing to complement the high engagement score (76.44%), ensuring the screenplay maintains a captivating rhythm.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentWhile the screenplay has notable strengths in originality and concept, refining character development and intensifying emotional impact would elevate its potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Script Characters | 9.50 | 100 | KILLING ZOE: 9.25 | Ghostbusters: 9.50 |
Script Originality | 9.50 | 97 | Coco: 9.25 | fight Club: 9.50 |
Script Emotional Impact | 8.50 | 90 | Hot Fuzz: 8.25 | fight Club: 8.50 |
Scene External Goal | 7.73 | 85 | Sherlock Holmes: 7.66 | Ghostbusters: 7.73 |
Script Premise | 8.75 | 85 | Hot Fuzz: 8.50 | Erin Brokovich: 8.75 |
Scene Originality | 8.90 | 81 | the 5th element: 8.89 | Pawn sacrifice: 8.90 |
Overall Script | 8.30 | 79 | Labyrinth : 8.29 | the black list (TV): 8.30 |
Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 77 | Narcos Pilot: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Scene Concept | 8.3 | 77 | Deep Cover: 8.2 | the 5th element: 8.3 |
Script Structure | 8.25 | 66 | Gladiator: 8.00 | Titanic: 8.25 |
Scene Story Forward | 8.3 | 64 | Coco: 8.2 | Titanic: 8.3 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.65 | 63 | The Pianist: 7.63 | Ghostbusters: 7.65 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.8 | 55 | Birdman: 7.7 | Spy kids: 7.8 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.7 | 52 | Sherlock Holmes: 7.6 | Erin Brokovich: 7.7 |
Script Structure | 8.14 | 52 | Memento: 8.13 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.14 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.5 | 49 | The shining: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
Scene Pacing | 8.30 | 48 | Sense8: 8.29 | Ghostbusters: 8.30 |
Script Visual Impact | 8.00 | 48 | Inside Out: 7.75 | face/off: 8.00 |
Script Theme | 8.25 | 47 | Stranger Things: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
Scene Formatting | 8.14 | 45 | Erin Brokovich: 8.13 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.14 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.02 | 42 | Fleabag: 8.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.02 |
Script Conflict | 7.50 | 29 | Zootopia: 7.25 | Casablanca: 7.50 |
Scene Plot | 7.6 | 26 | Birdman: 7.5 | severance (TV): 7.6 |
Scene Overall | 8.1 | 18 | Swingers: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
Scene Character Changes | 5.9 | 16 | Charlie and The Choclate Factory: 5.8 | Arsenic and old lace : 5.9 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 6.7 | 11 | Back to the future: 6.6 | Dr. Strangelove: 6.7 |
Scene Characters | 7.6 | 2 | Severance: 7.5 | Ghostbusters: 7.6 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by witty dialogue, fast-paced action, and a blend of humor and suspense.
Best representation: Scene 4 - Confrontation at the Lab. Scene 4 best showcases the writer's unique voice because it effectively combines humor, suspense, and supernatural elements. The dialogue is witty and engaging, the action is fast-paced, and the overall tone is one of excitement and anticipation.
Memorable Lines:
- Venkman: He slimed me! He slimed me! (Scene 16)
- Stantz: We got one! (Scene 18)
- Stantz: Are you troubled by strange noises in the night? Do you experience feelings of dread in your basement or attic? Have you or your family actually seen a spook, specter or ghost? If the answer is yes, then don't wait another minute. Just pick up the phone and call the professionals -- Ghostbusters. (Scene 8)
- Stantz: It's the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man! He was on all the packages we used to buy when I was a kid. We used to roast Stay-Puft marshmallows at Camp Waconda! (Scene 40)
- Venkman: Ghostbusters! (Scene 38)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a diverse and multifaceted writing style, encompassing elements of humor, supernatural themes, action, suspense, and drama. It blends various genres and narratives, creating a unique and engaging storytelling experience.
Style Similarities:
- Dan Aykroyd
- Harold Ramis
- Joss Whedon
- Shane Black
- Guillermo del Toro
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Engine: Gemini
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
The 'Ghostbusters' screenplay is a highly entertaining and well-crafted blend of comedy, science fiction, and horror. Its strengths lie in its strong opening, memorable characters, excellent pacing, and unique premise. However, some aspects of Venkman's character and the portrayal of female characters might require adjustments for contemporary audiences. Overall, the script has the potential to be a highly successful and iconic film.
- Strong opening that sets the tone and introduces the characters and their personalities effectively. high ( Scene 1 (2) Scene 2 (9) )
- Well-developed and memorable characters with distinct personalities and comedic timing. high ( Scene 2 (9) Scene 5 (29) )
- Excellent pacing that balances humor, action, and suspenseful moments, keeping the audience engaged. high ( Scene 16 (79) Scene 32 (162) )
- Clever use of advertising and media to build the Ghostbusters brand and integrate it into the narrative. medium ( Scene 8 (39) )
- Unique blend of comedy, science fiction, and horror creates a fresh and entertaining experience. high
- Venkman's character, while humorous, could be seen as overly sexist and his advances towards Dana might need to be toned down for modern audiences. medium ( Scene 10 (53) Scene 28 (138) )
- The female characters, particularly Dana and Janine, could benefit from more agency and development beyond their roles as romantic interests or assistants. medium
- The conflict with the EPA feels somewhat underdeveloped and could be explored further with more nuanced motivations. low ( Scene 22 (108) )
- Stantz's encounter with the ghost in the Fort Detmerring barracks is suggestive and might require careful handling depending on the target audience. medium ( Scene 30 (148) )
- The scene in the St. Marks Playhouse demonstrates the potential for expanding the Ghostbusters universe with diverse paranormal encounters. low ( Scene 35 (182) )
Engine: GPT4
Recommend
Executive Summary
Ghostbusters is a highly engaging and innovative screenplay that effectively combines humor with supernatural elements. The character development, particularly of Venkman, is well-executed, and the dialogue is memorable. While the pacing could be improved and some character arcs further developed, the screenplay offers a unique and entertaining experience with broad appeal.
- The climax of the screenplay is highly engaging and creatively combines humor with supernatural action, maintaining audience interest and providing a satisfying resolution. high ( Scene 42 (222) )
- The opening scene effectively sets up the supernatural premise and introduces the eerie atmosphere, hooking the audience early on. high ( Scene 1 (1) )
- Character development is strong, particularly with the transformation of Venkman from a skeptic to a committed Ghostbuster, which is pivotal for the narrative arc. medium ( Scene 9 (52) )
- The screenplay effectively uses humor to balance the darker, supernatural elements, making it accessible and enjoyable for a wider audience. medium ( Scene 7 (34) )
- The dialogue is sharp and memorable, contributing to character development and the screenplay's cultural impact. medium ( Scene 38 (190) )
- Some scenes, particularly the action sequences, could benefit from clearer descriptions to enhance visualization and directorial interpretation. medium ( Scene 14 (75) )
- The pacing in the middle part of the screenplay could be tightened to maintain momentum and keep the audience engaged throughout. medium
- The character arcs for supporting characters like Winston could be more developed to give them more depth and relevance to the plot. low
- The screenplay could explore more deeply the consequences of the Ghostbusters' actions on the city and its inhabitants to add layers to the narrative. low
- Introducing subplots or additional conflicts could provide more complexity and enrich the storyline, making it more compelling. low
- A deeper exploration of the historical and mythological elements could enhance the thematic depth of the screenplay. medium
- More scenes showing the public's reaction to the Ghostbusters could provide additional context and emotional impact. low
- Inclusion of more diverse character backgrounds could broaden the appeal and relatability of the story. low
- The creative use of the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man as both a humorous and threatening antagonist is a unique and memorable aspect of the screenplay. high ( Scene 42 (222) )
- The screenplay's ability to blend science fiction, horror, and comedy genres is notably effective and innovative. high ( Scene 1 (1) )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay for "Ghostbusters" effectively establishes a compelling and clear premise, blending comedy, science fiction, and horror elements to create a unique and engaging narrative. The initial scenes quickly introduce the core characters, their scientific background, and their skeptical yet humorous approach to the supernatural. The premise's strength lies in its originality, combining elements of ghost hunting with witty dialogue and relatable characters. The clarity of the premise allows the audience to easily understand the central conflict and the Ghostbusters' mission to capture and contain supernatural entities. However, there's room for further exploration of the characters' backstories and motivations, particularly regarding their initial interest in the paranormal, to deepen audience engagement. See More
Structure: 8.25, The screenplay's structure effectively sets up the premise and character dynamics, leading to a thrilling climax and resolution. However, improvements to pacing and refining certain plot elements could enhance the overall narrative impact. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay effectively explores and communicates its themes and messages, offering a blend of humor, suspense, and commentary on science versus the supernatural. While some themes are more fully developed and impactful than others, the screenplay manages to convey a coherent and engaging message about the importance of facing one's fears and embracing unconventional approaches to problem-solving. See More
Visual Impact: 8, The screenplay employs a mix of humor and visual effects, but its descriptions lack vividness and creativity, relying on conventional imagery. Revisiting the screenplay with a focus on crafting unique visual descriptions and incorporating innovative visual storytelling techniques could enhance its cinematic impact. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.5, The screenplay effectively elicits emotional responses through witty banter, supernatural tension, and personal growth. To enhance the emotional depth, consider incorporating moments of vulnerability, exploring the fears of secondary characters, and adding scenes that focus on the emotional complexities of the supernatural elements. See More
Conflict: 7.5, The screenplay effectively sets up a central conflict between the Ghostbusters, a group of scientists dedicated to catching and containing ghosts, and various supernatural forces threatening the safety of New York City. The stakes are personal for several characters, especially Dana Barrett, who becomes possessed by an ancient evil entity. While the screenplay succeeds in presenting an engaging conflict and escalating stakes, there are opportunities to deepen the emotional impact and heighten the narrative tension. See More
Originality: 9.5, The screenplay exhibits a delightful blend of nostalgia and innovation, capturing the essence of the original 'Ghostbusters' while introducing fresh elements that keep the story engaging and entertaining. The narrative deftly weaves supernatural thrills with comedic moments, creating a unique and immersive cinematic experience. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Amid the tranquility of the New York Public Library, a librarian's serenity is shattered as books inexplicably soar off the shelves in the stacks. Despite her attempts to locate the source of the commotion, she remains unsuccessful, leaving her increasingly terrified.
- The scene opens with a Librarian spotting a haunting apparition and screaming. In a separate scene, Dr. Peter Venkman performs an ESP experiment on two students, administering electric shocks to the male participant while the female volunteer accurately guesses symbols. However, Ray Stantz's sudden entry brings news of a supernatural occurrence at the New York Public Library, forcing Venkman to abandon his experiment with the female student, promising to return later. The scene ends with Venkman and Stantz rushing off to investigate the reported paranormal sighting.
- Venkman and Stantz join Spengler at the library to investigate paranormal activity. Spengler is convinced he has detected something significant, but Venkman is skeptical. The Head Librarian is concerned and asks them to handle the situation discreetly.
- In the darkened stacks of a library, Venkman grills a shaken librarian about a haunting. As Stantz revels in excitement and Spengler tracks the spectral presence, they confront the ghost. Stantz's ill-timed command unleashes its wrath, transforming it into a raging demon that blasts them with its fiery breath.
- Venkman, Stantz, and Spengler flee from the library after their first encounter with a ghost and seek refuge in their lab at Columbia University. Excited by the possibilities, they're met with disappointment when Dean Yaeger informs them their grant has been terminated and they must leave the premises.
- Stantz and Venkman, recently expelled from Columbia University, discuss their future. Venkman convinces Stantz to take a risk and start their own business. They secure funding from the Irving Trust and consider an abandoned fire station as their potential headquarters for their new venture, Ghostbusters.
- Dana Barrett enters her skyscraper apartment and politely declines her neighbor Louis Tully's offer of mineral water. Louis watches as she enters, feeling a mix of awkwardness and frustration at her repeated rejections.
- Children encounter a ghost, prompting a Ghostbusters call. Dana experiences eerie events at home, witnessing a gateway to another dimension emerge from her refrigerator.
- In the firehall of the newly painted Ghostbusters headquarters, the crew gathers and prepares for their first case. Stantz arrives in a beat-up Cadillac ambulance, which Venkman questions. Spengler ignores Janine's advances while Dana Barrett hesitantly arrives to share her strange experiences.
- Dana Barrett undergoes a lie detector test, revealing her strange experience with something in her refrigerator. The Ghostbusters team listens and offers theories, but Dana remains skeptical. Venkman checks Dana's apartment but finds nothing amiss. He expresses interest in staying overnight to investigate, but Dana refuses and asks him to leave, leaving the mystery unresolved.
- Venkman leaves Dana's apartment feeling rejected, while Louis Tully is locked out and unable to retrieve his newspaper. Back at the firehouse, Venkman, Stantz, and Spengler discuss their lack of progress in capturing paranormal activity. Meanwhile, a couple at the Hotel Sedgwick experiences a horrifying event on their wedding night, leading to a call for help.
- A hotel manager calls the Ghostbusters to investigate disturbances on the twelfth floor. The Ghostbusters arrive and enter the lobby, attracting curious interest from the guests.
- The Ghostbusters investigate a possible ghost sighting on the twelfth floor of an apartment building. They are nervous because they have never had a successful test with any of their equipment. They find high readings near the air vents, which suggests that the ghost is using the duct system to get around. They also encounter a bellboy and a stunning woman wrapped in a towel. Despite their efforts, they do not find the ghost.
- Ray Stantz discovers a grotesque vapor feeding off dirty dishes. Despite his initial fear, Stantz attempts to capture it, but the vapor evades his particle thrower and escapes through a wall.
- A noxious vapor seeps through a hotel room wall, damaging a man's jacket. In a nearby hallway, Venkman witnesses a room service cart crash and encounters the vapor. The vapor, appearing as a yellow haze, exhibits sentient behavior and moves towards Venkman.
- The Ghostbusters enter the Banquet Room and find the entity on the ceiling. They try to trap it with their proton streams, but it keeps dodging. Spengler warns them not to cross the streams, but Venkman ignores him and takes charge. They manage to trap the entity, but Spengler almost crosses the streams. The entity escapes and flies down the hall toward Venkman.
- The Ghostbusters team up to trap a vaporous ghost in a banquet room. Despite initial challenges, they coordinate effectively, utilizing their proton packs and a metal box trap. They successfully capture the ghost, bringing the tense encounter to a satisfying conclusion amidst flashes of light and smoke.
- Emerging from an elevator with a captured ghost, the Ghostbusters face a skeptical Hotel Manager over their fee. Venkman negotiates while Spengler handles a curious street punk. Outside, reporters and a crowd surround the Ghostbusters, leading to a reluctant performance of their theme song for publicity.
- The Ghostbusters respond to paranormal incidents in New York City, including Yankee Stadium and Tudor City, amidst increasing sightings and media attention.
- While Stantz is interviewed by Joe Franklin about ghost movies and Larry King discusses ghostbusting on his radio show, Venkman meets Dana at Lincoln Center. They delve into Dana's case and the enigmatic name 'Zuul', setting up a meeting to further explore the matter.
- Janine handles phone calls and Winston Zeddemore fills out a job application. Venkman and Stantz return from a ghostbusting job, exhausted and covered in ecto-slime. Janine informs them that an EPA agent is waiting to see Venkman. They discuss the need for more help, and Venkman jokingly suggests that Janine could find a better job in housekeeping or food service. Stantz briefly reviews Winston's resume and explains what the Ghostbusters do, but Winston remains skeptical.
- EPA administrator Peck demands a visit to the Ghostbusters' storage facility but is refused by Venkman who dismisses Peck's skepticism. Peck threatens legal action, which Venkman challenges. The scene ends with Peck leaving the office unresolved.
- Concerned about the deteriorating grid around the storage facility, Spengler, Stantz, Winston, and Venkman discuss the potential risks posed by the increasing number of captured spirits and the possibility of a massive psychokinetic energy surge.
- A mysterious cloud looms over Dana's apartment, emanating an eerie glow from a temple-like structure. A stone Terror Dog adorning the temple awakens and its glowing red eyes fix upon Dana. Dana arrives home, exhausted, and hears a lively party in Louis' apartment. Louis urges her to join, but she declines, anticipating a visitor. Upon entering her apartment, Dana is startled by a loud phone call from her mother. Following the conversation, she observes an unsettling light emitting from the kitchen door. Abruptly, scaly hands emerge from her chair and seize her, pinning her down. The chair slides towards the kitchen door, which swings open, revealing a fiery chamber where a Terror Dog awaits. Dana screams as she is propelled into the kitchen, the door slamming shut behind her.
- Amidst a sunny gathering on Dana's rooftop, a blinding flash illuminates the night. Simultaneously, Louis' frugal party in his apartment descends into chaos as a live Terror Dog escapes, sending guests into a frenzy. Louis' penny-pinching showcase turns into a desperate escape as the fearsome beast pursues him into the park.
- Louis is pursued by the Terror Dog through Central Park and seeks refuge in the Tavern on the Green, but is ignored. The Terror Dog attacks Louis, who is seemingly killed, but he is possessed by the Terror Dog and makes strange demands of a Coachman. Louis, now possessed by the Terror Dog, walks away, followed by two mounted Policemen.
- Venkman arrives at Dana's apartment building with flowers and encounters cops discussing a cougar at a party. He finds Dana transformed into Zuul, the Gatekeeper. Dana speaks of preparing for Gozer's arrival, and Venkman suggests going to the bedroom, temporarily resolving the conflict.
- In Dana's bedroom, Venkman attempts to communicate with the possessed Dana, who levitates off the bed as Zuul takes control.
- Louis Tully reveals himself as Vinz Clortho, the Keymaster of Gozer. Spengler interrogates Louis, learning about Gozer's plans and potential forms. Janine expresses concern for Spengler's safety, sensing something ominous about Louis. Spengler dismisses her fears, claiming they are insignificant in the grand scheme of the universe. As they await further developments, Spengler realizes they may need Stantz's assistance.
- Stantz tries on an officer's uniform in a restored period room at Fort Detmerring, only to fall asleep and encounter a ghostly apparition. The mist takes on a human form and interacts with Stantz in a mysterious and slightly sensual way, creating a sense of fear and confusion. The scene ends with Stantz submitting to the apparition as his belt comes undone and his zipper slowly opens.
- Stantz acts strangely, law enforcement arrives demanding access to the storage grid, despite protests from Janine and Spengler. Venkman attempts to mediate but is arrested. As the grid is deactivated, the lights fail and the building shakes, with strange light and debris escaping the storage room.
- An explosion at a storage facility unleashes an iridescent energy geyser that wreaks havoc in Lower Manhattan. Louis interprets the explosion as a sign, while the Ghostbusters face accusations from the authorities. Amidst the chaos, the geyser moves towards Dana's building, further escalating the situation.
- As Louis walks past a subway entrance, he witnesses a crowd of people fleeing from a strange apparition. Throughout the city, terrifying events unfold: a hot dog vendor's cart is possessed by an onion-headed vapor creature, a businessman's cab driver is revealed to be a rotting corpse, and an invisible molester terrorizes women in an office. The scene is filled with conflict and chaos, with no resolution in sight as the invisible molester continues to run wild in the office.
- In the depths of Central Park's eerie underpass, Louis confronts a group of muggers. Their sinister intentions are met with an unexpected response as Louis transforms into a formidable being, emitting iridescent lights from his mouth. Overwhelmed by terror, the muggers flee, leaving Louis to continue his solitary journey through the darkness.
- Winston expresses skepticism as the Ghostbusters discover the building's connection to Gozer and Ivo Shandor. A police official arrives to summon them amid the city's descending chaos.
- The Ghostbusters face accusations of causing a city-wide disaster at a tense meeting with high-ranking officials. Despite Peck's accusations, the Mayor ultimately trusts the Ghostbusters to handle the supernatural crisis.
- As an earthquake rocks the city, Louis arrives at Dana's apartment and ignores warnings to leave. He confronts Dana, leading to a passionate encounter. Meanwhile, Venkman, Stantz, and the Mayor prepare for action, discussing the unusual events. They meet up with their team to charge their equipment and depart in the Ectomobile.
- The Ghostbusters arrive at Dana's apartment building amidst a large crowd of spectators. After considering Winston's suggestion to flee, they enter the building after the pavement collapses beneath them.
- Dana and Louis transform into the Terror Dogs and the Temple of Gozer opens, revealing Gozer himself. The Ghostbusters engage in battle but are easily defeated by Gozer's immense power. As the building trembles, the Ghostbusters regroup to strategize against the formidable Gozer.
- As the Ghostbusters struggle to determine Gozer's form, the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man, a product of Stantz's childhood, materializes and threatens their rooftop position. Despite Stantz's apology for his choice, the Ghostbusters prepare to confront the massive marshmallow man with their proton packs, ready to protect the city from this unexpected threat.
- Peck demands the Ghostbusters' arrest, but the cop refuses and flees. The Ghostbusters fire at the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man, eventually defeating him by redirecting the beams to the Terror Dogs, causing an explosion that sucks the marshmallow monster into another dimension. Dana and Louis, trapped within the Terror Dogs, are revealed to be alive. The Ghostbusters agree to cover up the incident as an Act of God.
- The Ghostbusters emerge triumphant from a perilous encounter, greeted by a cheering crowd. As they drive off in their iconic Ectomobile, two curious bums stumble upon a bewildering sight - a massive mound of marshmallow in the street, leaving them to speculate about its origins and the possibility of a nearby hot chocolate.
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Character Dana Barrett
Description Dana, initially portrayed as a skeptic who doesn't believe in the supernatural, readily accepts the existence of a ghost in her refrigerator without much resistance. This contradicts her earlier skepticism.
( Scene 8 (39) ) -
Character Peter Venkman
Description Venkman's character fluctuates between being a serious scientist and a comedic, womanizing figure. While this adds humor, it can occasionally feel inconsistent.
( Scene 10 (53) Scene 11 (57) )
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Description The Terror Dogs on Dana's rooftop are initially shown as stone statues, but they mysteriously disappear and reappear as living creatures without explanation. This sudden transformation creates a logical gap in the story.
( Scene 24 (112) Scene 25 (119) )
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Description The explosion of the storage facility releases all the captured ghosts, but their impact on the city and the Ghostbusters' efforts to recapture them are not addressed, leaving a significant plot hole.
( Scene 32 (162) ) -
Description The Mayor's sudden trust in the Ghostbusters after initially dismissing them feels somewhat abrupt and convenient for the plot's progression.
( Scene 36 (185) )
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Description Venkman's flippant and sarcastic remarks towards Walter Peck, while humorous, might seem unprofessional for someone trying to defend their scientific credibility.
( Scene 22 (108) )
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Element Ghostbusters' exhaustion
( Scene 20 (97) Scene 26 (128) Scene 29 (153) )
Suggestion The repeated emphasis on the Ghostbusters' exhaustion could be streamlined to maintain pacing and avoid redundancy.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Ray Stantz | Throughout the screenplay, Ray Stantz starts off as a dedicated scientist eager to explore the supernatural. As the story progresses, he faces challenges that test his beliefs and abilities. He learns to balance his impulsiveness with caution and critical thinking, ultimately growing into a more well-rounded and mature character who harnesses his passion for the greater good. By the end of the feature, Stantz emerges as a seasoned paranormal investigator who has found a balance between his excitement and rationality. | The character arc for Ray Stantz is well-developed, showcasing his growth and evolution throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more emphasis on the internal struggles he faces as he learns to balance his impulsiveness with caution. This would add depth to his character and make his transformation more impactful for the audience. | To improve the character arc for Ray Stantz, consider incorporating more moments of self-reflection and internal conflict as he navigates the challenges of exploring the supernatural. Show how his impulsiveness leads to consequences that force him to reevaluate his approach and develop a more strategic mindset. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters to further highlight his growth and transformation over the course of the feature. |
Dr. Venkman | Throughout the screenplay, Dr. Venkman starts off as a skeptic who is dismissive of the supernatural. However, as he faces more and more encounters with the paranormal, he begins to question his beliefs and eventually becomes more open-minded and accepting of the unknown. This transformation leads him to become a key player in the team's success in dealing with supernatural threats. | The character arc for Dr. Venkman is well-developed and allows for growth and change throughout the screenplay. However, it could benefit from more internal conflict and emotional depth to make his transformation more impactful and believable. Additionally, his confrontational speaking style could be toned down slightly to allow for more vulnerability and complexity in his character. | To improve the character arc, consider adding moments of introspection and self-doubt for Dr. Venkman as he grapples with his changing beliefs. This will make his transformation more relatable and engaging for the audience. Additionally, explore different facets of his personality beyond just sarcasm and skepticism, such as moments of genuine fear or empathy, to create a more well-rounded and dynamic character. |
Egon Spengler | Throughout the screenplay, Egon Spengler's character arc involves delving deeper into the mysteries of the supernatural world and facing his own fears and doubts. As he encounters more powerful and dangerous entities, he must confront his own limitations and vulnerabilities. This journey leads him to a greater understanding of himself and the importance of teamwork and trust in overcoming challenges. | The character arc for Egon Spengler is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for the audience to follow. However, there could be more opportunities to explore his emotional depth and personal growth throughout the screenplay. Adding moments of vulnerability and introspection could further enhance his character development. | To improve the character arc for Egon Spengler, consider incorporating scenes that delve into his past experiences and how they have shaped his approach to the supernatural. Show moments of internal conflict and growth, where he must confront his own fears and doubts. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters in more depth to showcase his emotional connections and vulnerabilities. |
Venkman | Venkman starts off as a charismatic and humorous leader of the Ghostbusters team, using his wit and charm to handle supernatural challenges. As the story progresses, he faces personal vulnerabilities and shows a mix of bravery and reluctance in dealing with the possessed Dana. This leads to a moment of self-reflection where he realizes the importance of facing his fears head-on and embracing his role as a protector. By the end of the film, Venkman emerges as a more well-rounded character, still witty and confident but with a deeper understanding of his own strengths and weaknesses. | The character arc for Venkman is well-developed, showcasing his growth and evolution throughout the story. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal struggles and emotional journey to make his transformation more impactful. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth could add layers to his arc and provide opportunities for further growth. | To improve the character arc, consider adding moments of vulnerability and self-doubt for Venkman to make his journey more relatable and compelling. Show how his interactions with other characters, especially Dana and Zuul, impact his development and challenge his beliefs. Additionally, focus on his internal conflicts and emotional growth to create a more nuanced and engaging character arc. |
Stantz | Throughout the screenplay, Ray Stantz undergoes a character arc where he starts as a curious and enthusiastic Ghostbuster, eager to explore the supernatural world. As the story progresses, he faces his fears and grows into a brave and determined leader within the team. Stantz learns to balance his excitement with practicality and becomes a voice of reason, ultimately demonstrating courage and leadership in the face of danger. | The character arc for Ray Stantz is well-developed, showcasing his growth and development throughout the feature. However, there could be more emphasis on his emotional depth and vulnerability, especially in key moments of fear and uncertainty. Additionally, Stantz's interactions with other characters could be further explored to deepen his relationships and add more layers to his personality. | To improve the character arc for Ray Stantz, consider adding more scenes that highlight his emotional depth and vulnerability, particularly in moments of fear and uncertainty. Explore his relationships with other characters, such as his friendship with Venkman and his dynamic with the rest of the team, to add complexity to his personality. Additionally, give Stantz more opportunities to showcase his leadership skills and bravery, reinforcing his growth throughout the story. |
Dana Barrett | Dana Barrett starts off as a strong-willed and independent woman who is thrown into a world of supernatural terror. Initially skeptical, she becomes intrigued by the paranormal events in her apartment and is determined to uncover the truth. As she encounters the Gateway to Zuul and eventually becomes possessed by the ancient entity, she undergoes a transformation from a normal woman to a vessel for supernatural forces. | The character arc for Dana Barrett is well-developed, showcasing her evolution from a skeptic to a vessel for supernatural forces. However, there could be more emphasis on her internal struggles and emotional turmoil as she goes through this transformation. Additionally, more depth could be added to her relationships with other characters to further enhance her arc. | To improve the character arc for Dana Barrett, consider delving deeper into her internal struggles and emotional journey as she is possessed by Zuul. Show more of her conflicting emotions and the toll it takes on her psyche. Additionally, explore her relationships with other characters, such as her friends or family, to provide more context and depth to her transformation. |
Dana | Dana starts off as a skeptical and independent woman who is thrust into a world of supernatural chaos. As she becomes possessed by Zuul, she struggles with conflicting emotions of fear, confusion, and a hint of lust. Through her ordeal, she discovers inner strength and resilience, ultimately finding a resolution to her situation and emerging stronger and more self-assured. | The character arc for Dana is well-developed, showcasing her transformation from a skeptical individual to a strong and empowered woman. However, there could be more exploration of her internal struggles and the emotional toll of being possessed by a supernatural entity. Additionally, her relationship with Venkman could be further developed to add depth to her character. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Dana's internal conflicts and the psychological impact of being possessed. Show more of her emotional journey and the evolution of her relationship with Venkman. This will add complexity to her character and make her transformation more impactful for the audience. |
Spengler | Throughout the screenplay, Spengler starts off as a serious and analytical scientist who is solely focused on the scientific aspects of ghostbusting. However, as the story progresses, he begins to open up more emotionally and connect with his team on a personal level. He learns to balance his logical mindset with empathy and understanding, ultimately becoming a more well-rounded and relatable character. | The character arc for Spengler is well-developed and allows for growth and depth in his personality. However, to further enhance his arc, it would be beneficial to explore his backstory and motivations in more detail. This could provide a deeper understanding of why he is so dedicated to his work and how he became the logical and analytical person he is. Additionally, adding more moments of vulnerability and emotional conflict for Spengler could make his character arc even more compelling. | To improve the character arc for Spengler, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that reveal his past experiences and how they have shaped his personality. This could add layers to his character and make his growth throughout the story more impactful. Furthermore, creating more moments of emotional conflict and growth for Spengler, such as facing personal fears or making difficult decisions, can add depth and complexity to his arc. |
Peck | Peck starts off as a rigid and aggressive EPA administrator who is focused on enforcing regulations and shutting down the Ghostbusters. However, as the story progresses, he begins to witness the Ghostbusters' heroic actions and sees the value they bring to the community. This leads to a shift in his perspective, as he starts to question his initial beliefs and eventually becomes an ally to the Ghostbusters in their fight against a greater threat. | The character arc for Peck is somewhat predictable and lacks depth. It follows a typical redemption arc where the antagonist becomes an ally to the main characters. To improve the character arc, there should be more complexity added to Peck's motivations and internal struggles. This will make his transformation more believable and engaging for the audience. | To enhance Peck's character arc, consider delving deeper into his backstory and exploring the reasons behind his skepticism and aggression towards the Ghostbusters. Show moments of vulnerability and conflict within Peck as he grapples with his changing beliefs. Additionally, consider adding more interactions between Peck and the Ghostbusters to highlight the gradual shift in his perspective. This will create a more compelling and nuanced character arc for Peck. |
Winston | Winston starts off as a skeptical and practical member of the team, motivated by financial gain. As he becomes more involved in the supernatural events, he begins to believe in the paranormal and develops a deeper connection with his teammates. Through facing challenges and overcoming obstacles, Winston grows to embrace the supernatural world and becomes a valued member of the Ghostbusters team. | The character arc for Winston is well-developed, showing his growth from skepticism to belief in the supernatural. However, it could benefit from more internal conflict and emotional depth to further explore his journey. Additionally, more focus on his personal motivations and relationships with other characters could enhance his arc and make it more engaging for the audience. | To improve the character arc for Winston, consider adding moments of internal conflict where he grapples with his beliefs and values. Explore his personal motivations for joining the Ghostbusters team and how they evolve throughout the story. Develop his relationships with other characters, particularly his interactions with the other Ghostbusters, to show his growth and connection with the team. |
Louis | Louis starts off as a quirky and eccentric individual known for his frugality and knowledge of expenses. However, after being possessed by the Terror Dog, he undergoes a transformation into an otherworldly being with a connection to supernatural forces. Through his actions in the showdown with the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man, Louis ultimately embraces his newfound powers and plays a crucial role in defeating the antagonist. | The character arc for Louis is well-developed, showcasing a transformation from a comedic relief character to a key player in the conflict. However, there could be more exploration of Louis's internal struggles and emotions as he grapples with his newfound powers and connection to ancient deities. Additionally, his transition from a bumbling individual to a powerful being could be further emphasized to create a more impactful and satisfying character arc. | To improve the character arc for Louis, consider delving deeper into his internal conflicts and emotional journey as he navigates his transformation. Show more moments of vulnerability and growth as he comes to terms with his powers and the responsibilities that come with them. Additionally, highlight the contrast between his quirky, comedic nature and his newfound strength to create a more dynamic and compelling character arc. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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The Power of Science and Technology | The Ghostbusters use their scientific knowledge and equipment to capture ghosts and defeat supernatural threats. | The film highlights the importance of science and technology in solving problems and protecting society from the unknown. | ||||||||||||
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The Importance of Teamwork | The Ghostbusters work together as a team to overcome challenges and defeat the supernatural. | The film shows that teamwork is essential for success and that we can achieve more when we work together. | ||||||||||||
The Supernatural and the Unknown | The film explores the existence of the supernatural and the unknown, with the Ghostbusters facing a variety of ghosts, spirits, and other paranormal entities. | The film taps into our fear of the unknown and the supernatural, while also exploring the possibility of coexistence between the natural and supernatural worlds. | ||||||||||||
The Battle Between Good and Evil | The Ghostbusters represent the forces of good, while Gozer and his minions represent the forces of evil. | The film presents a classic battle between good and evil, with the Ghostbusters fighting to protect the innocent and the city from supernatural threats. | ||||||||||||
The Importance of Humor and Wit | The film incorporates humor and wit into its storytelling, with the Ghostbusters often using sarcasm and jokes to defuse tense situations. | The humor and wit add a lighthearted and entertaining element to the film, making it more enjoyable and relatable. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to confront their fears, prove themselves as capable Ghostbusters, and maintain composure in the face of supernatural threats. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to protect the city from supernatural threats, capture ghosts, and maintain their ghostbusting business's reputation |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the clash between the known and the unknown, science vs. the supernatural, and skepticism vs. belief in the paranormal. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals, along with the philosophical conflict, push them to confront their fears, prove themselves, and navigate the blurred lines between science and the unknown, leading to personal growth and courage.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the protagonist's actions and decisions, creating tension, suspense, and building the narrative arc towards the resolution of the supernatural threat, ultimately contributing to the climax and resolution of the story.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts explore themes of bravery, belief in the unknown, science vs. the supernatural, and the importance of facing fears and working together to confront challenges, adding depth and complexity to the narrative.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Unseen Disturbance | Eerie, Suspenseful, Frightened | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
2 - Interrupted ESP Test | Suspenseful, Humorous, Excited | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - The Library Investigation | Humorous, Suspenseful, Scientific | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Ghostly Encounter in the Stacks | Humorous, Suspenseful, Excited | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Confrontation at the Lab | Sarcastic, Excited, Confrontational, Shocked | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - The Birth of Ghostbusters | Humorous, Excited, Desperate | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Awkward Neighborly Encounter | Humorous, Quirky, Light-hearted | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Supernatural Disturbances and Ghostbusting | Suspenseful, Humorous, Terrifying | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
9 - The Birth of Ghostbusters | Humorous, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
10 - Dana's Mysterious Encounter | Humorous, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - A Night of Frustration and Horror | Humorous, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Hotel Disturbance | Humorous, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Ghostbusters Investigate the Apartment Building | Humorous, Suspenseful, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Ray Encounter | Suspenseful, Humorous, Supernatural | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Paranormal Hallway Encounter | Suspenseful, Humorous, Light-hearted | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
16 - The Banquet Room Battle | Suspenseful, Humorous, Action-packed | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
17 - Ghostbusting Success | Humorous, Suspenseful, Exciting | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Ghostbusters Capture and Controversy | Humorous, Exciting, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 4 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Ghostbusters on the Case | Humorous, Mysterious, Exciting | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Ghostly Encounters on the Airwaves | Humorous, Mysterious, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - The Ghostbusters' Office | Humorous, Sarcastic, Fast-paced | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Confrontation with the EPA | Humorous, Sarcastic, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Storage Facility Concerns | Suspenseful, Humorous, Dark | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - A Nightmarish Encounter | Suspense, Fear, Mystery | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Unleashed Terror | Humorous, Suspenseful, Eerie | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Louis Possessed | Suspense, Humor, Dark | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Unveiling the Gatekeeper | Suspenseful, Humorous, Sinister | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Dana's Possession | Supernatural, Humorous, Intense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - The Keymaster's Revelation | Humorous, Suspenseful, Supernatural | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Sensual Encounter | Suspense, Supernatural, Erotic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Confrontation at the Firehouse | Tense, Humorous, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - The Iridescent Geyser | Tense, Sarcastic, Chaotic, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Night of Terror | Suspenseful, Humorous, Supernatural | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Unwelcome Encounter in the Dark | Suspenseful, Dark, Humorous | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - Preparing for Gozer's Arrival | Suspenseful, Humorous, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Confrontation at City Hall | Humorous, Serious, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Explosive Encounter and Preparations Amidst Earthquake | Suspenseful, Dark, Humorous, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Arrival at Dana's Apartment Building | Tense, Exciting, Humorous, Surreal | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
39 - Confrontation with Gozer | Tense, Humorous, Surreal, Epic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - The Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man Arrives | Tense, Humorous, Surreal, Epic | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - Confrontation and Triumph: The Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man's Defeat | Humorous, Tense, Surreal, Exciting | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Post-Victory Celebrations | Humorous, Exciting, Surreal | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Engaging dialogue
- Effective blending of horror, comedy, and fantasy elements
- Witty dialogue
- Engaging concept
- Suspenseful and entertaining atmosphere
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited emotional depth
- Limited character development
- Some cliched elements
- Some predictable outcome
- Some elements may be too chaotic for some viewers
Suggestions
- Focus on developing deeper emotional connections with the characters to increase the audience's investment in the story
- Explore secondary character development to create a more well-rounded and dynamic ensemble cast
- Avoid relying on cliched elements that may feel predictable to the audience
- Consider adding surprising plot twists or unexpected character reactions to challenge the audience's expectations
- Strive for clarity in intense or chaotic scenes to prevent confusion or disorientation for viewers
- Physical environment: The world depicted in this screenplay is a blend of modern urban settings and supernatural elements. Libraries, universities, offices, hotels, fire stations, apartments, and public spaces are all featured, creating a sense of realism and relatability. However, the presence of ghosts, paranormal activities, ancient temples, and otherworldly entities adds a layer of mystery and wonder to the world.
- Culture: The screenplay incorporates various cultural elements, including the scientific and rational perspective of the Ghostbusters, the skepticism and fear of the general public, and the ancient mythology surrounding Gozer and the Sumerian deities. This blend of cultures adds depth and complexity to the world.
- Society: The society depicted in the screenplay reflects a modern urban environment with a mix of social groups, beliefs, and attitudes. The Ghostbusters operate as a unique and somewhat marginalized group, often facing skepticism from authorities and the general public. The film also touches on themes of media sensationalism, scientific ethics, and the role of individuals in shaping the society they live in.
- Technology: The screenplay heavily features advanced technology, including proton packs, ghost traps, PKE meters, and various scientific equipment used by the Ghostbusters. This technology plays a crucial role in the team's investigations and confrontations with the supernatural. The film also incorporates elements of science fiction and fantasy, such as the gateway to another dimension and the appearance of the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology of the world in the screenplay shape the characters' experiences and actions in several ways. - The presence of ghosts and paranormal activities forces the Ghostbusters to adapt and develop specialized skills and equipment to deal with the unknown. - The skepticism and fear of the general public create challenges for the Ghostbusters in gaining acceptance and support for their work. - The ancient mythology surrounding Gozer and the Sumerian deities adds a sense of danger and urgency to the Ghostbusters' mission, as they must confront powerful and enigmatic forces. - The advanced technology available to the Ghostbusters gives them an edge in their investigations and confrontations with the supernatural, but it also raises ethical questions and the potential for misuse.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay in several ways: - The modern urban setting provides a familiar and relatable backdrop for the supernatural events that unfold, making the story feel more grounded and immersive. - The blend of cultures adds complexity to the narrative, as the Ghostbusters must navigate different perspectives, beliefs, and motivations while investigating paranormal activities. - The societal structure influences the obstacles and challenges that the Ghostbusters face, as they operate as a somewhat marginalized group often facing skepticism and resistance. - The advanced technology plays a crucial role in the Ghostbusters' investigations and confrontations with the supernatural, driving the action and suspense of the narrative.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring various themes and ideas: - The conflict between science and the supernatural challenges traditional notions of reality and the limits of human understanding. - The ethical implications of using advanced technology for paranormal investigations raise questions about responsibility and the potential consequences of tampering with unknown forces. - The societal reaction to the supernatural highlights the power of fear, superstition, and the search for meaning in the face of the unknown. - The film's exploration of ancient mythology and Sumerian deities adds a timeless and mythological dimension to the narrative, connecting it to broader themes of good versus evil and the battle between order and chaos.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by witty dialogue, fast-paced action, and a blend of humor and suspense. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a dynamic and engaging atmosphere. It balances humor with tension and adds depth to the characters and their relationships. |
Best Representation Scene | 4 - Ghostly Encounter in the Stacks |
Best Scene Explanation | Scene 4 best showcases the writer's unique voice because it effectively combines humor, suspense, and supernatural elements. The dialogue is witty and engaging, the action is fast-paced, and the overall tone is one of excitement and anticipation. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Frequent High Tone Scores | Most scenes in this screenplay have a high tone score, indicating a consistent level of suspense, excitement, or humor throughout the narrative. |
Suspense and Humor | Suspenseful scenes are often complemented by humor, creating a blend of紧张and lighthearted moments. This combination adds depth and keeps the audience engaged. |
Humor and Character Changes | Scenes with high humor scores tend to have less character changes, suggesting that comedic moments may take precedence over character development in those instances. |
High Stakes Scenes | High stakes scenes, those with significant consequences for the characters, are often accompanied by intense dialogue and emotional impact, enhancing the overall tension and drama. |
Mysterious and Suspenseful | Scenes that combine mystery and suspense tend to have higher overall grades, indicating that the combination of intrigue and tension is particularly effective in engaging the audience. |
Supernatural and Suspenseful | The combination of supernatural elements and suspenseful tones consistently results in high grades, suggesting that this blend of the otherworldly and the thrilling resonates well with the audience. |
Surrealism and Excitement | Scenes with surreal elements are often accompanied by high excitement scores, indicating that the unexpected and imaginative can effectively elevate the intensity and engagement of the narrative. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates strong writing craft with a blend of humor, suspense, and supernatural elements. The writer effectively creates engaging narratives, develops compelling characters, and keeps the audience entertained with a unique voice and style. However, there are areas that could benefit from further refinement to elevate the overall impact and consistency of the writing.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Read 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder to study in-depth character development and story structuring techniques. | This book provides valuable insights into creating compelling characters, building character arcs, and structuring a screenplay for maximum impact. |
Screenplay | Study screenplays by Aaron Sorkin for exceptional dialogue writing and fast-paced storytelling. | Analyzing Sorkin's screenplays will help improve the writer's ability to create sharp, witty, and engaging dialogue that drives the narrative forward. |
Video | Watch behind-the-scenes footage of films with similar tone and pacing to understand how directors and writers achieve the desired effect. | Observing how successful films handle tone and rhythm visually can provide valuable practical insights into storytelling techniques. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Damsel in Distress | Dana Barrett is frequently rescued by the Ghostbusters, particularly from Gozer and the Terror Dogs. | A female character who is constantly in need of rescue by a male character, often portrayed as weak and helpless. |
The Chosen One | The Ghostbusters are tasked with defeating Gozer, an ancient deity, implying that they are the only ones who can save the world. | A character who is destined to save the day, often due to some special power or ability. |
MacGuffin | The Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man is summoned by Gozer as a physical manifestation of the Ghostbusters' fear, but it ultimately serves no real purpose in the plot. | An object or device that is important to the plot, but has no real value or purpose beyond its symbolic meaning. |
Supernatural Scare | The film features a number of supernatural scares, including ghosts, demons, and other paranormal entities. | A sudden and unexpected event that is designed to scare the audience. |
Comic Relief | Winston Zeddemore is often used as a source of comic relief, providing humor and levity in tense situations. | A character who provides humor and lightens the mood in a serious or dramatic situation. |
The Power of Love | Dana Barrett's love for Peter Venkman helps to save the day, as it weakens Gozer and allows the Ghostbusters to defeat him. | The idea that love can overcome all obstacles, even supernatural ones. |
The Chosen One | Louis Tully, the Keymaster, and Dana Barrett, the Gatekeeper, are chosen to aid in the summoning of Gozer. They are not necessarily evil, but they are destined to play a role in the apocalypse. | A character who is destined to save the day, often due to some special power or ability. |
The Hero's Journey | The Ghostbusters go on a journey to defeat Gozer, facing many challenges and obstacles along the way. | A story structure that follows a hero on a journey to achieve a goal, often involving a transformation or growth in character. |
The Chosen One | The Ghostbusters are the only ones who can defeat Gozer, as they are the only ones with the knowledge and experience to do so. | A character who is destined to save the day, often due to some special power or ability. |
The Power of Love | Dana Barrett's love for Louis Tully helps to save the day, as it weakens Gozer and allows the Ghostbusters to defeat him. | The idea that love can overcome all obstacles, even supernatural ones. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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16 | Venkman: He slimed me! He slimed me! |
18 | Stantz: We got one! |
8 | Stantz: Are you troubled by strange noises in the night? Do you experience feelings of dread in your basement or attic? Have you or your family actually seen a spook, specter or ghost? If the answer is yes, then don't wait another minute. Just pick up the phone and call the professionals -- Ghostbusters. |
40 | Stantz: It's the Stay-Puft Marshmallow Man! He was on all the packages we used to buy when I was a kid. We used to roast Stay-Puft marshmallows at Camp Waconda! |
38 | Venkman: Ghostbusters! |
Some Loglines to consider:
Three parapsychologists lose their university funding and start a ghost-catching business in New York City, only to find themselves facing a supernatural threat of apocalyptic proportions. |
When ghosts invade Manhattan, a team of eccentric scientists with high-tech gadgets and a knack for the supernatural become the city's only hope. |
A group of unlikely heroes must overcome their personal differences and bureaucratic obstacles to save New York City from a Sumerian god and his marshmallow minion. |
A team of eccentric scientists turned ghost hunters face the ultimate supernatural threat in a battle to save New York City from a gooey, gigantic marshmallow man. |
When ghosts start popping up all over New York, only three professors and a streetwise newcomer can save the day in this supernatural comedy. |
Science meets the supernatural as a ghost-catching squad wrangles spirits across New York, culminating in a showdown with an ancient deity looking to remodel the city. |
It's a race against time as four ghostbusters put their paranormal prowess to the test against an apocalyptic threat in the heart of New York City. |
Who you gonna call? A ragtag team of ghostbusters faces off against a marshmallow mascot turned malevolent god in this action-packed supernatural comedy. |
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Explanation: The 'Ghostbusters' screenplay is a highly entertaining and well-crafted blend of comedy, science fiction, and horror. Its strengths lie in its strong opening, memorable characters, excellent pacing, and unique premise. However, some aspects of Venkman's character and the portrayal of female characters might require adjustments for contemporary audiences. Overall, the script has the potential to be a highly successful and iconic film.
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Explanation: Ghostbusters is a highly engaging and innovative screenplay that effectively combines humor with supernatural elements. The character development, particularly of Venkman, is well-executed, and the dialogue is memorable. While the pacing could be improved and some character arcs further developed, the screenplay offers a unique and entertaining experience with broad appeal.