The Sweet Hereafter
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
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USP: Discover a powerful and poignant exploration of family, community, and the human condition in this groundbreaking script. Featuring a unique blend of intimate character moments and stark urban imagery, the narrative weaves together the stories of individuals grappling with loss, addiction, and the search for justice. The dialogue is sparse yet impactful, conveying emotion and atmosphere through subtle interactions. With its innovative storytelling techniques and distinctive characters, this script offers a fresh perspective on legal drama, family dynamics, and moral ambiguity. Dive into a world where the mundane and the extraordinary collide, shedding light on the complexities of the human spirit and the power of connection.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Mystery, Family, Thriller, Legal, Romance, Slice of Life
Setting: Contemporary, Summer cottage, car wash, city phone booth, fairground, airport, motel
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates a strong foundation in originality, creativity, and emotional depth. It effectively engages the audience through its unique narrative structure, compelling characters, and thought-provoking themes. While there are areas for improvement in character changes and unpredictability, the overall screenplay stands out for its emotional impact and thematic richness.
Themes: Loss and Grief, Parent-Child Relationships, Justice and Lawsuits, Community and Neighborhood, Memory and Nostalgia
Conflict and Stakes: The main conflicts include Mitchell's struggle with Zoe's addiction, Billy's grief over the loss of his children, and Nicole's guilt and memory loss from the accident. The stakes involve family relationships, legal battles, and emotional healing.
Overall Mood: Serious and emotional
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 4: Serious and tense tone at the Bide-A-Wile Motel during Mitchell's meeting with the Walkers
Standout Features:
- Emotional Depth: Rich emotional exploration of family dynamics and personal struggles
- Legal Intrigue : Intriguing legal battles and moral dilemmas adding depth to the storyline
- Character Development : Strong character arcs and relationships that drive the narrative
Comparable Scripts:
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$15-20 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-55, fans of drama with emotional depth and complex character relationships
Marketability: Strong emotional themes with relatable family dynamics and legal intrigue
Compelling characters and dramatic storytelling with potential for critical acclaim
Exploration of addiction and grief with strong performances from a talented cast
Profit Potential: Moderately high, with potential for awards recognition and positive critical reception driving box office success
Scene Level Percentiles
Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay has a high emotional impact (98.6957%) and strong character development (91.3043%), suggesting a compelling narrative and well-developed characters.
- The originality score is 100%, indicating a unique and fresh concept.
- The plot rating (53.4783%) suggests room for improvement in the story's progression and structure.
- Conflict level (21.7391%), stakes (32.4324%), and pacing (25.5319%) could be enhanced to create more tension and suspense.
- Internal and external goal scores (57.4468% and 27.6596%, respectively) indicate potential issues with character motivation and clear objectives.
The writer's style appears to be more intuitive, with strong character development and dialogue, but could benefit from focusing on concept and plot elements.
Balancing Elements- Improving the plot and pacing could help balance the strong character development and emotional impact.
- Developing clearer character goals and raising the stakes can contribute to a more engaging and suspenseful narrative.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has a unique concept and strong character development, but could benefit from improvements in plot progression, conflict, and pacing to optimize its potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Scene Emotional Impact | 9.1 | 99 | The Pianist: 8.9 | Squid Game: 9.1 |
Scene Overall | 8.8 | 93 | Inception: 8.7 | the dark knight rises: 8.8 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.5 | 90 | Inception: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
Scene Characters | 8.7 | 89 | Poor Things: 8.6 | Easy A: 8.7 |
Scene Dialogue | 8.0 | 72 | Almost Famous: 7.9 | fight Club: 8.0 |
Script Characters | 8.50 | 72 | Swingers: 8.25 | Titanic: 8.50 |
Scene Plot | 8.1 | 63 | 12 Monkeys: 8.0 | Vice: 8.1 |
Scene Formatting | 8.24 | 61 | Le souvenir des belles choses: 8.23 | The Sweet Hereafter: 8.24 |
Scene Originality | 8.76 | 53 | groundhog day: 8.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.76 |
Script Emotional Impact | 7.75 | 46 | Inception: 7.50 | Erin Brokovich: 7.75 |
Script Originality | 8.25 | 43 | House of cards pilot: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
Script Visual Impact | 7.75 | 40 | Midsommar: 7.50 | fight Club: 7.75 |
Scene Concept | 8.0 | 39 | Poor Things: 7.9 | a few good men: 8.0 |
Overall Script | 8.00 | 39 | Mo: 7.90 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Script Premise | 7.75 | 39 | Inception: 7.50 | There's something about Mary: 7.75 |
Script Structure | 8.10 | 37 | The Wizard of oz: 8.09 | glass Onion Knives Out : 8.10 |
Script Structure | 7.75 | 35 | Inception: 7.50 | fight Club: 7.75 |
Script Theme | 8.00 | 30 | Swingers: 7.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.00 |
Scene High Stakes | 6.9 | 30 | Cruel Intentions: 6.8 | Arsenic and old lace : 6.9 |
Script Conflict | 7.50 | 30 | Zootopia: 7.25 | Casablanca: 7.50 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 27 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Pacing | 8.17 | 26 | Lucifer: 8.16 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.17 |
Scene Engagement | 8.81 | 21 | Community: 8.78 | The Sweet Hereafter: 8.81 |
Scene External Goal | 7.05 | 19 | Killers of the flower moon: 7.04 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.05 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.19 | 19 | The Greatest Showman: 7.18 | Schindler's List: 7.19 |
Scene Conflict Level | 6.8 | 18 | Midnight cowboy: 6.7 | the pursuit of happyness: 6.8 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.5 | 18 | Community: 7.4 | Easy A: 7.5 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its blend of intimate character moments and stark urban imagery, which creates a sense of contrast and tension. The dialogue is sparse but impactful, conveying emotion and atmosphere through subtle interactions.
Best representation: Scene 1 - A Tense Conversation at the Car Wash. This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it effectively blends intimate family moments with urban grit, showcasing the writer's ability to create depth and tension through contrasting elements.
Memorable Lines:
- Mitchell: Every time I get on one of these flights to rescue Zoe, I remember the summer we almost lost her. (Scene 22)
- Nicole: It just seems...kind of weird. (Scene 18)
- Nicole: Once more he stept into the street, And to his lips again Laid his long pipe of smooth straight cane; And ere he blew three notes such sweet soft notes as yet musician's cunning Never gave the enraptured air - There was a rustling, seemed like a bustling Of merry crowds justling at pitching and hustling, Small feet were pattering, wooden shoes clattering, Little hands clapping and little tongues chattering, And, like fowls in a farm-yard when the barley is scattering, Out came the children running. All the little boys and girls, With rosy cheeks and flaxen curls, And sparkling eyes and teeth like pearls. Tripping and skipping, ran merrily after The wonderful music with shouting and laughter... (Scene 19)
- Dolores: I remember wrenching the steering wheel to the right and slapping my foot against the brake petal. I wasn't the driver anymore. (Scene 35)
- DOLORES: The true jury of a person's peers is the people of her town. Only they, the people who have known her all her life, and not twelve strangers, can decide her guilt or innocence. (Scene 26)
Writing Style:
The writing style in this screenplay is characterized by intense dialogue, complex character dynamics, and emotional depth. The scenes often explore moral dilemmas, legal conflicts, and personal struggles, blending intimate character moments with larger societal issues. The dialogue is sharp and witty, revealing deeper character motivations and conflicts. The narrative structure varies, with some scenes featuring linear storytelling and others employing non-linear or introspective approaches.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- David Mamet
- Richard Linklater
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Recommend
Executive Summary
The Sweet Hereafter is a powerful and thought-provoking screenplay that explores the aftermath of a tragic accident on a small town. Its strengths lie in its complex characters, realistic dialogue, and evocative visual imagery. However, the pacing can be slow at times and the ending may leave some viewers wanting more closure. Overall, it is a compelling and well-crafted story that would appeal to audiences interested in character-driven dramas with a focus on human resilience in the face of tragedy.
- The screenplay explores the complex themes of grief, guilt, and the search for meaning in the face of tragedy with depth and nuance. high
- The characters are well-developed and their motivations are clear, even when they are flawed or make questionable decisions. high
- The dialogue is natural and realistic, capturing the pain and confusion of the characters. high
- The use of non-linear storytelling effectively creates suspense and keeps the audience engaged. medium
- The visual imagery is evocative and creates a strong sense of atmosphere. medium
- The pacing can be slow at times, particularly in the first act. medium
- The ending may leave some viewers wanting more closure, particularly regarding the resolution of the lawsuit and the characters' emotional journeys. medium ( Scene 30 Scene 39 )
- The subplot involving Mitchell's daughter Zoe, while adding depth to his character, feels somewhat disconnected from the main narrative. low ( Scene 22 Scene 31 )
- The use of the poem 'The Pied Piper of Hamelin' as a recurring motif adds a layer of symbolism and foreshadowing to the narrative. high ( Scene 19 )
- The character of Abbott, despite being physically incapacitated, has a powerful presence and serves as a moral compass in the story. medium ( Scene 9 Scene 26 )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.75, The screenplay's premise sets up an engaging and emotionally charged narrative that delves into complex themes of family relationships, guilt, and the search for justice. However, some elements could be refined to enhance its overall clarity and audience intrigue. See More
Structure: 7.75, The screenplay features a strong foundation and cohesive structure, effectively engaging the audience with its compelling plot development. While the narrative unfolds with clarity and intrigue, there are opportunities to enhance the pacing and elevate the overall storytelling dynamics. See More
Theme: 8.0, The screenplay explores a multifaceted range of themes, including the complexities of family relationships, the consequences of grief and loss, and the search for justice and redemption. While some themes are presented with clarity and emotional depth, others could benefit from more nuanced exploration and integration into the narrative. See More
Visual Impact: 7.75, This screenplay portrays a rich tapestry of emotional and evocative visual imagery, effectively capturing the complex emotions, struggles, and relationships of its characters. The screenplay excels in its vivid descriptions of the natural environment, often using nature as a metaphor to mirror the characters' inner journeys. Additionally, the use of symbolism and recurring visual motifs adds depth and meaning to the story, enhancing its overall impact. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.75, The screenplay effectively elicits a range of emotions, with strengths in character relatability, emotional variety, and emotional complexity. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the emotional depth and impact by exploring transformational emotional arcs, resolving emotional themes more satisfyingly, and building on the universality of emotional appeal. See More
Conflict: 7.5, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes, primarily centered around the bus accident and its aftermath. However, there are opportunities to enhance the depth and impact of these elements, particularly in the development of personal stakes for the characters and the escalation of consequences. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay exhibits a strong foundation in originality and creativity, with its compelling characters, unique narrative approach, and thought-provoking themes. The story delves into the complexities of addiction, trauma, and the search for justice, offering fresh perspectives and emotionally resonant moments. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- The scene opens with a serene morning at a summer cottage where a young family is waking up. The scene then shifts to Mitchell Stehens going through a car wash while listening to music and taking a phone call from his daughter Zoe, who is in a phone booth in a city and being approached by a figure. There is potential conflict between Zoe and the figure outside the phone booth, but it is not resolved in this scene. The tone is contrasted between the peaceful summer cottage, the mechanical and noisy car wash, and the tense and uncertain situation with Zoe in the city. The scene ends with Zoe on the phone with her father, while the figure waits outside the phone booth.
- In this tense and uncertain scene, Mitchell is in a car wash while talking to his daughter Zoe on the phone. They reminisce about an old memory of Zoe getting soaked in a car wash when she was a child. However, due to Zoe's recent drug use, Mitchell struggles to recognize his own daughter. Zoe expresses her desire to talk to her father, but Mitchell's confusion and Zoe's frustration leave their conversation unresolved. The scene takes place at night, with Mitchell in the car wash and Zoe in a phone booth. Key pieces of dialogue include Zoe expressing her desire to talk to her father and Mitchell questioning her identity due to her changed behavior from drug use. The scene ends with Mitchell not responding to Zoe's question about what the problem is.
- This scene contains three sub-scenes with distinct conflicts and tones. Zoe calls her father Mitchell from a phone booth, confronting him about his assumptions, which leaves Mitchell emotionally stunned. In contrast, Sam Burnell proudly watches his daughter Nicole rehearse at a fairground. The scene then shifts to Mitchell assisting a father, Peter, in changing his toddler's diaper in an airport washroom, creating a friendly and calm atmosphere.
- In this scene, Mitchell finds himself stuck in a car wash and is unable to get the attention of the workers. He becomes increasingly anxious as he tries to leave his car and enters the car wash office, where he finds no one. He then picks up an electric guitar, causing it to produce feedback. Meanwhile, at a fairground, Sam reassures Nicole about her upcoming performance, but Nicole senses that Sam is not completely confident in her. The scene ends with Nicole excitedly hugging Sam after sensing his sincerity.
- Mitchell Stevens, a lawyer who has been in an accident, arrives at Bide-A-Wile Motel and meets Risa and Wendell Walker, the motel receptionist and her husband. After a brief conversation, Mitchell reveals his identity and expresses the importance of discussing business with them. However, Risa and Wendell are exhausted and reluctant due to their own recent accident. The conflict between Mitchell's need to discuss business and Risa and Wendell's exhaustion remains unresolved, creating a somber and tense atmosphere in the reception area with a magnificent mountain range in the background.
- In this scene, two storylines unfold: at the fairground, Sam and Nicole enjoy ice cream while observing a school bus full of children led by the cheerful Dolores Driscoll into an exhibition barn. Simultaneously, at the Bide-A-Wile Motel, lawyer Mitchell Stevens meets with Wendell and Risa Walker to discuss and take notes on the Lambstons' and their neighbors' backgrounds, including the Hamiltons, Prescots, Bilodeaus, Atwaters, and Ottos. Mitchell aims to find suitable parents for his case, while the fairground scene evokes a light and nostalgic atmosphere, contrasting with the serious and investigative tone of the motel scene. The scene concludes with Mitchell stepping outside for a private call.
- Mitchell Stephens, two years after the accident, is on a first-class airplane cabin struggling to fix his headset. A stewardess tries to assist him, but to no avail. Alison Jones, an old friend of Mitchell's daughter Zoe, offers her headset, and they strike up a conversation. Alison reminds Mitchell of their past and her connection to his family, helping him to eventually remember her. The scene takes place during dusk and is filled with nostalgia and tension as Mitchell grapples with his past. The visual elements include Mitchell trying to fix his headset, the stewardess checking it, and Alison offering hers. The scene ends with the stewardess giving Alison a new headset, and the camera remains focused on Mitchell's face.
- Wanda and Hartley Otto, along with their adopted son Bear, wait for the school bus. Wanda gives Bear a psychedelic photograph for the school bazaar, causing bus driver Dolores Driscoll to teasingly comment on its unusual nature. This light-hearted exchange resolves any minor conflict quickly, and the scene ends with Dolores driving off with Bear, as the narrators Mitchell and Dolores share brief remarks on the Ottos' parenting style.
- In the modest living room of Dolores's house, Mitchell converses with Dolores about the Ottos, who were friends with her son Bear. Meanwhile, Dolores's husband Abbott, paralyzed after a stroke, watches Mitchell intensely, making him uncomfortable. Dolores shares her positive memories of the Ottos and Bear's victory at the pet show, but Mitchell's assumption of the Ottos' drug reputation contrasts with Dolores's description, creating an unresolved conflict. The scene ends with Mitchell staring at Bear's photograph, feeling torn between his unease and his sympathy for Dolores.
- The scene opens with Bear saying goodbye to his parents from a school bus, followed by his siblings waving at their father Billy, who is driving behind the bus. Dolores, in a conversation with Mitchell, discloses Billy's routine of following the bus to check on his children. Mitchell inquires about any problems Billy faced, and Dolores responds by sharing his wife's death from cancer and how he has been raising their children alone. The scene takes place in the morning, both inside and outside the school bus, and continues in Dolores's house during the day. The tone is nostalgic and slightly melancholic, with a focus on the Ansel family's interactions and Dolores's recollections. The scene ends with Dolores staring at Mitchell after sharing her observations about Billy's feelings.
- Billy, en route to work, greets his children and converses with Risa over the phone about childcare arrangements for their kids. Risa, currently at the Bide-A-Wile Motel, is displeased with the early pickup time set for Nicole's supervision. Wendell's noisy roof repairs in the background are also discussed, adding to the minor conflicts in the scene. The scene concludes with Risa reluctantly accepting the childcare arrangements and Billy continuing his drive to work.
- Mitchell and Alison share a tense conversation in a first-class cabin of an airplane while eating dinner. Mitchell reveals that he is going to visit his daughter Zoe, who is in a clinic near a beach, creating a somber atmosphere. Alison picks at her meat undecidedly, and Mitchell sends his food back to the stewardess. The scene ends with Mitchell getting up and leaving Alison alone in the cabin.
- Mitchell Stephens, a lawyer, visits the Otto residence to discuss a potential lawsuit regarding a bus accident. The Ottos express their anger and desire for justice, and Mitchell promises to pursue the case and reveal the responsible party. The scene takes place in the Ottos' two-storey house and is serious and emotional in tone. Mitchell explains his belief in the role of negligence in the accident, and the Ottos express their desire for justice. The scene ends with Mitchell's promise to pursue the case.
- Mitchell leaves home and has a tense conversation with Alison about his feelings towards his daughter Zoe's drug addiction. He expresses his anger and frustration, and Alison listens with empathy. The scene takes place outside the Ottos' house in the daytime and then on an airplane in the evening. It ends with Mitchell apologizing to Alison for his outburst.
- Billy spends a joyful afternoon playing with his kids in the yard, followed by a brief conversation with their babysitter, Nicole. Later, he sneaks into a motel room to meet Risa, where they share an intimate moment while listening to a hockey game on the radio. The scene transitions from the playful atmosphere of Billy's house to the cozy intimacy of the motel room, with no major conflicts but a subtle tension regarding Wendell's potential suspicion.
- In the warm and cozy setting of Billy's house, Nicole reads Robert Browning's 'The Pied Piper of Hamelin' to Jessica and Mason. As Nicole reads, Mason's curiosity is piqued, and he asks questions about the story, particularly about the Pied Piper's motives. Nicole explains the Pied Piper's anger towards the townsfolk, and Mason, satisfied with the answer, asks Nicole if he can sit beside her on the bus the next day. Nicole agrees, and the scene ends with her continuing to read the story to Jessica and Mason.
- In this calm and introspective scene, Risa, staying at the Bide-A-Wile Motel with Billy, finds herself watching him in the shower while lost in a daydream about her life with Sean. As they discuss their children's struggles with attachment and independence, Risa contemplates her son's emotional reliance on her and Billy's children's familiarity with his presence. The scene concludes with Billy's departure and Risa focusing on a mundane task, all the while reflecting on her life and her relationship with Billy.
- Nicole brings clothes from Mrs. Ansel's belongings, intending to wear them, which leads to a bittersweet conversation with Billy about memories and loss. Billy plans to donate the clothes to charity, and Nicole expresses her fondness for Mrs. Ansel. The scene ends with Nicole leaving the house, heading towards her father's car, while Billy remains sad, unable to fully express his feelings about his late wife.
- NICOLE and SAM arrive at the Burnell barn in the car, where they become physically intimate. The scene is filled with tension, and NICOLE avoids conversation with one-word answers. The setting is dimly lit, and the scene concludes with NICOLE reading a poem aloud as the camera glides past them.
- In this nostalgic and introspective scene, Dolores, a bus driver, picks up children along her route, comparing them to berries being plucked. She reflects on her interactions with Sean, a student with a learning disability, and his attentive parents, Risa and Wendell Walker. The scene takes place on a bus traveling to school, at Dolores's house, and at the Bide-A-Wile Motel in the morning. Key pieces of dialogue include Dolores's description of the children as berries and her account of Sean's learning disability. The scene ends with Dolores contemplating her experiences with Sean and his parents, hinting at a potential tension between her role as a bus driver and the well-being of the children.
- Dolores bids farewell to Sean, who is leaving with his mother Risa on a bus. Sean hesitates to go, but Risa insists. The scene is filled with nostalgia and sadness as Dolores reflects on her past as a school bus driver, a job that provided her with a sense of purpose and belonging. The main conflict lies in Sean's desire to stay with his mother and Risa's insistence that he goes. The scene ends with a flashback to the school bus accident, adding to the emotional weight of the moment.
- Mitchell shares a nostalgic yet panicked story with Alison, recounting a medical emergency with Zoe when she was three, at a summer cottage. Klara tried to breastfeed while Mitchell called the hospital, speaking to a young doctor who, despite his nervousness, attempted to confidently assist Mitchell, who was in a panic. The scene ends with Alison staring at Mitchell, taken aback by his detailed story of a seemingly irrelevant stranger.
- In a tense and emotional morning scene at a summer cottage, Father (Young Mitchell) receives a phone call informing him that his daughter Zoe may have been bitten by baby black widow spiders, requiring an emergency tracheotomy. While Mother (Klara) breastfeeds Zoe with a wild-eyed stare of fear, Father gathers his courage and begins the procedure. The scene then cuts to a first-class cabin on an airplane at night, where Father (now Mitchell) begins to recount the story to Alison.
- Mitchell recounts performing surgery on his daughter to Alison, while Billy identifies his children's bodies and has a heated discussion with Risa about the accident's cause. The scene takes place in various settings, and the main conflict lies between Billy and Risa, who disagree about someone's responsibility for the accident. The tone is somber and emotional, with significant dialogue and visual elements highlighting the characters' grief and tension.
- Mitchell Stephens, a lawyer, encounters Billy Ansel, the father of the children involved in a bus accident, at a gas station. Mitchell offers his legal services, but Billy refuses and threatens him. Mitchell then reveals his personal struggles with his drug-addict daughter. The scene is tense and emotional, and ends with Mitchell turning to look at his ringing phone. The main conflict, Billy's refusal to accept Mitchell's legal services, is not resolved in this scene.
- In this serious and emotional scene, Mitchell visits Dolores at her house to discuss the legal implications of the accident. Dolores confesses to possibly driving over the speed limit, but Mitchell reveals that Billy is willing to testify otherwise. Mitchell proposes a suit for negligent infliction of emotional harm, which Dolores initially resists due to social repercussions. However, after her son Abbott seemingly gives his approval, Dolores agrees to let Mitchell bring the suit. The scene concludes with Mitchell planning his next step, as Dolores finds hope in the prospect of justice.
- Mitchell departs from Dolores's house as Nicole Burnell, a hospital patient, prepares to leave the hospital after being unable to recall the accident that caused her injuries. She is now in a wheelchair and will face a challenging recovery. Her family, including her mother and brother, are there to support her, but Nicole feels there is more to her recovery than just getting well. The scene is filled with emotion, hope, and apprehension, and ends with Nicole being wheeled out of the hospital, determined to face her recovery head-on.
- NICOLE arrives home to find a ramp for her wheelchair and a lavishly decorated room prepared by SAM. Gifts from a lawyer named MR. STEPHENS have also arrived, making NICOLE skeptical and demanding answers. Tension rises as NICOLE questions the need for a lawyer, creating uncertainty and suspicion in the scene.
- In this serious and reflective scene, Nicole watches her sister Jenny climb a tree while confined to her wheelchair on the Burnell home's porch. Sam explains their need for a lawyer, Mr. Stephens, to seek compensation from the town for the bus accident that injured Nicole. Financial strain and emotional challenges weigh on the family, but Sam reassures Nicole of their efforts. The scene concludes with Nicole pondering Mr. Stephens' future role, setting the stage for further developments.
- Mitchell receives a call from his drug-addict daughter Zoe while at a gas station with Billy. He shares his personal struggles and fears with Billy, then goes to an airplane cabin to stare at his other daughter Alison. The scene cuts back to the gas station where Mitchell accepts the call from Zoe, who reveals she couldn't sell her blood due to her addiction. Mitchell listens and empathizes with Zoe's situation, leaving him concerned and sad about her struggle with addiction.
- Zoe, a scared little girl, asks her father Mitchell for money on their way to the hospital, where she has tested positive for something. Mitchell struggles to understand the situation and reassures Zoe of his love and care.
- In this scene, Mitchell covers Alison with a blanket on the airplane and then drives to the Burnell home, where he meets Nicole, Sam, and Mary in the kitchen. Mitchell discusses the case and Nicole's feelings about the accident, acknowledging her grief over the other children who died. Nicole struggles with feelings of guilt and grief, which Mitchell validates. Sam tries to interject, causing some tension, and the scene ends with Nicole asking Mitchell what he wants her to do for the case.
- In the Burnell living room, Mitchell explains the purpose of the upcoming depositions to Nicole, emphasizing the need to maximize damages. Nicole, however, is determined to tell the truth, causing a rift in their views. Meanwhile, Nicole's parents, Sam and Mary, are present but mostly in the background, with Nicole particularly tense around her father. The scene concludes with Nicole steeled to share the truth during her deposition, feeling increasingly estranged from her parents.
- Sean Walker, reluctant to leave his mother Risa, boards a bus and sits next to Nicole Burnell, causing Dolores to feel uncomfortable. The scene then shifts to a community center where Dolores gives a deposition about the incident, recalling Sean's fearful demeanor and the events that followed. The scene ends with Dolores recalling Sean's distressing shriek, adding to the apprehension and unease.
- In this morning school bus scene, Sean leaps to the front after witnessing his mother's near-accident with a speeding vehicle. Dolores checks on Sean, and Risa, who is shaken, walks back to the office. Nicole reads to the children on the bus as the scene transitions to a community center for a deposition. Dolores is blamed for the near-accident, causing tension. The scene ends with Nicole reading The Pied Piper on the bus, providing a sense of relief.
- In the Burnell home, Sam, Jenny, and Nicole spend their evening in different activities until Mary announces Billy Ansel's plan to visit. Sam becomes anxious, Jenny retires to bed, and Nicole, after initially showing interest, decides to avoid Billy due to her guilt from the accident that killed his children. The scene concludes with Nicole retreating to her room, leaving the others to wait for Billy's arrival. The atmosphere is tense and emotionally charged, with key dialogue highlighting the characters' unease.
- Billy visits the Burnell home at night to ask Sam to drop the lawsuit against him for the accident involving Nicole. Sam and Mary express their financial struggles, but Billy offers to help pay for Nicole's care. However, Billy's desire to sell his house and move away adds to the tension, ultimately ending the scene with a sense of finality and resolution.
- Billy leaves the Burnell home after being told to move on by Sam. Nicole, watching him go, is upset and emotional. Inside, Sam informs Nicole of their plans to go to the courthouse the next day for her deposition. Nicole confronts Sam about his broken promises and her disability, causing Sam to turn away. The scene ends with Nicole acknowledging Sam's broken promises and Sam getting up to leave her room. The main conflict lies in Nicole's frustration with Sam's broken promises and her own disability, creating a tense and emotional atmosphere.
- Sam and his daughter Nicole, along with their lawyers Mitchell and Schwartz, arrive at the community center for Nicole's deposition in a bus accident case. Sam carries Nicole up the stairs as she remains uncooperative. During the deposition, Nicole reveals new information about the bus driver's speed and route, contradicting Sam's case. The scene is tense and emotional, with significant visual elements including Sam's struggle to carry Nicole, Nicole's confident demeanor, and Mitchell's growing concern. The scene ends with Nicole finishing her testimony and Schwartz asking Sam if he has any questions, to which he responds that he has none.
- Nicole, wheelchair-bound, waits in the car while her father, Sam, argues with Mitchell outside the community center. Through voiceover, Nicole expresses her hopes of keeping the computer and getting ice cream, urging her father to forget about the lawsuit and focus on why Mitchell lied. The scene is tense due to the argument, but Nicole's calmness and reflection provide a sense of calm. The scene ends with Sam looking at Nicole, who asks him about their chances of keeping the computer and getting ice cream.
- In the morning, Mitchell bumps into his former classmate Alison at the airport's arrival area while waiting for his luggage, and they exchange pleasantries. In the daytime, Sam takes Nicole to the fairground where she enjoys an ice-cream cone. Nicole inquires about Dolores, the bus driver, and Sam shares that her situation is uncertain. The scene has a positive and nostalgic tone, but there's a hint of sadness towards the end when Nicole brings up Dolores.
- The scene opens with Mitchell and Dolores sharing a moment of recognition at the airport. Nicole narrates, reflecting on the aftermath of the tragedy and how it has affected them all. The visual elements include Billy watching the demolished school bus, Nicole putting her children to bed, and Nicole watching the ferris wheel in her imagination, signifying her acceptance and closure after the tragedy. The tone is reflective and nostalgic, with a sense of acceptance and closure.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Zoe | Zoe's character arc in the screenplay follows her journey from a vulnerable and troubled young woman seeking connection and help to a place of acceptance and self-preservation. Throughout the story, Zoe confronts her father, challenges her own assumptions, and ultimately learns to accept her circumstances and seek help for her struggles. She goes from a place of defiance and anger to a place of vulnerability and honesty, showing growth and resilience in the face of adversity. | The character arc for Zoe is well-developed and engaging, showcasing her growth and transformation throughout the story. However, there could be more emphasis on her internal struggles and emotional journey, allowing the audience to connect with her on a deeper level. Additionally, the transitions between her different emotional states could be smoother to create a more cohesive and impactful character arc. | To improve the character arc for Zoe, consider adding more internal monologues or moments of introspection to delve into her emotional struggles and inner turmoil. Show her gradual transformation through subtle changes in her behavior and dialogue, highlighting her growth and development over time. Additionally, focus on creating seamless transitions between her different emotional states to create a more cohesive and impactful character arc. |
Mitchell | Mitchell starts off as a reserved and emotionally distant lawyer, haunted by past traumas and struggling with his daughter's addiction. Throughout the screenplay, he undergoes a transformation as he confronts his inner demons and strives to support his daughter. His journey culminates in a moment of emotional vulnerability and connection with his daughter, where he finally opens up about his own struggles and finds closure for both of them. | The character arc for Mitchell is well-developed and engaging, showcasing his emotional growth and personal struggles. However, there could be more clarity in his motivations and internal conflicts throughout the screenplay to enhance the audience's understanding of his journey. | To improve the character arc for Mitchell, consider incorporating more internal monologues or flashbacks that delve into his past traumas and emotional struggles. This will provide a deeper insight into his character and make his transformation more impactful for the audience. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters to further highlight his emotional depth and growth. |
Sam | Sam's character arc involves a shift from prioritizing financial concerns to prioritizing emotional well-being. Throughout the screenplay, Sam learns to let go of his guilt and seek redemption through supporting his daughter and finding connection and intimacy with his family. He grows from a reserved and anxious individual to a more empathetic and understanding father who prioritizes love and emotional support over practicalities. | The character arc for Sam is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for the audience to follow. However, there could be more depth added to Sam's internal struggles and emotional growth throughout the screenplay. It would be beneficial to explore Sam's past mistakes and guilt in more detail, as well as his journey towards self-forgiveness and acceptance. | To improve the character arc for Sam, consider incorporating more flashbacks or internal monologues to delve deeper into his emotional turmoil and past mistakes. Show more moments of vulnerability and introspection to highlight Sam's internal struggles and growth. Additionally, consider adding more interactions with other characters that challenge Sam's beliefs and help him evolve as a person. |
Nicole | Nicole's character arc in the screenplay follows her journey from grappling with survivor's guilt and emotional turmoil to finding inner strength and acceptance. Initially filled with sadness, resentment, and betrayal, Nicole confronts uncomfortable truths and learns to navigate her disability with resilience and introspection. Through moments of reflection and honesty, she begins to let go of her guilt and embrace hope for the future, ultimately finding peace and acceptance. | The character arc for Nicole is well-developed and allows for significant growth and emotional depth. However, there could be more clarity in showcasing her progression from vulnerability to strength, as well as a clearer resolution to her emotional journey. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on her relationships with other characters to further enhance her development. | To improve the character arc, consider adding more scenes that highlight Nicole's interactions with other characters, such as her family, friends, or caregivers. This will provide a deeper insight into her emotional journey and allow for more opportunities for growth and connection. Additionally, ensure that the resolution of her arc is clear and satisfying, showing her acceptance and growth in a poignant and impactful way. |
Risa | Risa starts off as a tired and emotionally detached woman, but as the story progresses, she begins to open up and confront her inner demons. Through her forbidden romance with Billy and the investigation into the accident, she finds strength and resilience, ultimately coming to terms with her past traumas and regrets. By the end of the screenplay, Risa has transformed into a strong-willed and determined woman who has found closure and a sense of peace. | The character arc for Risa is well-developed and allows for significant growth and transformation. However, there could be more clarity in her motivations and internal struggles throughout the screenplay. Additionally, the transitions between her different emotional states could be smoother to enhance the audience's connection with her journey. | To improve the character arc for Risa, consider incorporating more internal monologues or flashbacks to provide insight into her past traumas and regrets. This will help the audience better understand her motivations and emotional struggles. Additionally, focus on creating seamless transitions between her different emotional states to enhance the emotional impact of her transformation throughout the screenplay. |
Alison | Alison starts off as a cautious and guarded individual with unresolved issues and emotional baggage. Through her interactions with Zoe and Mitchell, she learns to open up and confront her own past traumas. As she becomes more empathetic and understanding towards others, Alison begins to find healing and closure for herself. By the end of the screenplay, Alison has grown into a more confident and compassionate person, able to offer support and comfort to those around her. | The character arc for Alison is well-developed and allows for significant growth and development throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more specific moments or scenes that highlight her internal struggles and growth, providing a more nuanced portrayal of her character journey. | To improve the character arc for Alison, consider adding flashback scenes or moments of introspection that delve deeper into her troubled past and emotional journey. This will help the audience better understand her motivations and actions, as well as showcase her growth and transformation more effectively. |
Dolores | Dolores starts off as a compassionate bus driver grappling with loss and nostalgia, but as she is faced with the need to clear her name and confront her past actions, she becomes conflicted and vulnerable. Through her journey, she ultimately finds a sense of closure and acceptance, coming to terms with her past and finding redemption. | The character arc for Dolores is well-developed and allows for emotional depth and growth. However, there could be more clarity in her motivations and internal struggles throughout the screenplay. Additionally, the resolution of her arc could be more impactful and satisfying for the audience. | To improve the character arc for Dolores, consider delving deeper into her internal conflicts and motivations from the beginning of the story. Show more of her emotional journey and the gradual shift in her perspective as she confronts her past. Additionally, ensure that the resolution of her arc is clear, impactful, and leaves the audience with a sense of closure and satisfaction. |
Billy | Billy's character arc follows his journey of grief, guilt, and resentment over the tragic accident and its aftermath. As he navigates the complexities of the lawsuit and his personal relationships, he may find redemption and acceptance. Through his struggles, he learns to confront his emotions, make peace with his past, and find a way to move forward while honoring the memory of his wife and children. | The character arc for Billy is well-developed and engaging, but it could benefit from more clarity and focus on his internal growth and transformation. The screenplay could delve deeper into Billy's emotional journey and provide more opportunities for him to confront his inner demons and find closure. Additionally, the resolution of his arc could be more impactful and satisfying for the audience. | To improve the character arc for Billy, consider adding more scenes that explore his emotional turmoil and inner conflict in greater depth. Provide moments of introspection and self-discovery for Billy to confront his grief and guilt, leading to a more cathartic resolution. Additionally, consider incorporating symbolic elements or visual motifs to enhance the emotional impact of Billy's journey and create a more resonant conclusion for his character arc. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Loss and Grief | Death of children in a bus accident, a father's loss of his daughter to drug addiction, a family's loss of their home, a woman's loss of her ability to walk | The screenplay explores the different forms of loss and grief experienced by various characters, and how they cope with and move forward from their tragedies. | ||||||||||||
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Parent-Child Relationships | A father's relationship with his drug-addicted daughter, a father's relationship with his surviving daughter, a bus driver's relationship with the children on her bus, a single father raising his children after his wife's death | The screenplay delves into the complexities and nuances of parent-child relationships, highlighting the love, sacrifice, and frustration that often come with them. | ||||||||||||
Justice and Lawsuits | A lawyer's pursuit of justice for a bus accident, a family's lawsuit against the town for negligence, a man's offer to pay for a victim's care instead of participating in a lawsuit | The screenplay examines the concept of justice and the role of lawsuits in achieving it, as well as the potential consequences and impact of such legal actions. | ||||||||||||
Community and Neighborhood | A small town's response to a tragic accident, neighbors helping each other out, a man selling his house and moving away | The screenplay explores the importance of community and neighborhood, and how they can provide support and comfort in times of need, as well as the challenges and conflicts that can arise within them. | ||||||||||||
Memory and Nostalgia | Characters reminiscing about old memories, a father reflecting on his past attempts to help his daughter, a woman reading a poem on the bus | The screenplay uses memory and nostalgia as a way for characters to connect with each other and to cope with their current struggles, highlighting the power of these emotions in shaping our identities and relationships. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals revolve around seeking connection, understanding, and closure with family members and others. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals involve navigating various challenges, seeking justice, and balancing personal and professional responsibilities. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around seeking justice, understanding, and acceptance in the face of tragedy, loss, and personal struggles. |
Character Development Contribution: The goals and conflicts contribute to the protagonist's growth by challenging their beliefs, values, and personal relationships. They navigate moral dilemmas, emotional turmoil, and seek redemption and closure.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative forward by creating tension, emotional depth, and character development. They shape the protagonist's journey and interactions with other characters, leading to a resolution of conflicts and personal growth.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts add thematic depth to the screenplay by exploring themes of family dynamics, loss, justice, redemption, and the complexity of human relationships. They highlight the importance of empathy, acceptance, and personal growth in the face of adversity.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - A Morning at the Cottage and an Uneasy Night in the City | Serene, Suspenseful, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
2 - A Tense Conversation at the Car Wash | Emotional, Reflective, Confrontational | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Tense Phone Call, Proud Father, and Helpful Stranger | Emotional, Reflective, Nostalgic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Stuck in a Car Wash and Reassurance at the Fairground | Confusion, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
5 - Lawyer's Arrival at Bide-A-Wile Motel and Unresolved Business Conflict | Tense, Melancholic, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | |
6 - Investigating the Lambstons' Neighbors and a Day at the Fair | Serious, Emotional, Informative | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - An Unexpected Encounter: Mitchell and Alison Reunite on an Airplane | Emotional, Reflective, Tense | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - The Psychedelic Photograph and the School Bus Stop | Affectionate, Light-hearted, Reflective | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 2 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - A Tense Conversation and Nostalgic Remembrance | Intense, Reflective, Nostalgic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Billy Ansel's Morning Farewell and Family Dynamics | Reflective, Melancholic, Nostalgic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Morning Disagreements: Childcare Arrangements and Roof Repairs | Serious, Tense, Emotional | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Mitchell's Revelation | Tense, Melancholic, Inquisitive | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
13 - Discussing a Potential Lawsuit: Mitchell Stephens Visits the Otto Residence | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Mitchell's Anguish over Zoe's Addiction | Intense, Emotional, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Billy's Playful Afternoon and Intimate Evening | Intimate, Sensual, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - A Cozy Evening with Browning's 'The Pied Piper of Hamelin' | Reflective, Inquisitive, Nostalgic | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
17 - Night at the Bide-A-Wile Motel: Reflections on Love and Motherhood | Intimate, Reflective, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 3 | 6 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Nicole's Tribute to Mrs. Ansel | Sad, Reflective, Nostalgic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 4 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
19 - Intimate Secrets in the Barn | Intimate, Reflective, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Berries on the Bus: A Morning with Dolores | Mysterious, Introspective, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | |
21 - Sean's Farewell and a Mother's Reflection | Intense, Melancholic, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - A Summer Cottage Medical Scare and a Young Doctor's Confidence | Reflective, Intense, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
23 - Emergency at the Summer Cottage: A Father's Determination | Tense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Tragic Accident and Tense Conversations | Intense, Emotional, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Tense Encounter at the Gas Station | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Dolores Agrees to Legal Action: A Step Towards Justice | Serious, Intense, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Nicole's Discharge and Uncertain Future | Reflective, Emotional, Hopeful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - The Suspicious Room | Emotional, Tense, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
29 - Unsteady Branches and Legal Battles: A Family's Struggle | Serious, Reflective, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Mitchell's Daughter Struggles and Mitchell's Inner Conflict | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Zoe's Fear and Need for Money | Emotional, Intense, Heartbreaking | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Mitchell's Visit to the Burnell Home and His Conversation with Nicole | Reflective, Emotional, Serious | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
33 - Preparing for Depositions: Truth and Tension | Serious, Reflective, Intense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Sean's Fearful Farewell and Dolores' Uneasy Deposition | Tense, Reflective, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - Sean's Near-Accident and a Tense Deposition | Tense, Emotional, Reflective | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Anxiety and Avoidance: The Approaching Visit of Billy Ansel | Anxious, Reflective, Regretful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Billy's Plea to Sam: A Desperate Attempt to Avoid Legal Consequences | Tense, Emotional, Serious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Nicole's Disappointment and Frustration | Melancholic, Reflective, Resentful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Nicole's Surprising Testimony in Bus Accident Case | Tense, Emotional, Serious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - The Community Center Argument | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
41 - Reunion at the Airport and a Day at the Fairground | Reflective, Hopeful, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
42 - Signs of Acceptance and Closure | Reflective, Haunting, Melancholic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Emotional depth
- Authentic dialogue
- Character development
- Intriguing mystery element
- Intriguing premise
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development in this scene
- Limited setting
- Lack of external conflict
- Slow pacing in some parts
- Some scenes may feel disconnected
Suggestions
- Focus on developing characters consistently throughout the entire screenplay
- Introduce more external conflict to keep the pacing and tension high
- Avoid relying too heavily on dialogue for emotional impact, incorporate visual elements to varying degrees as well
- Ensure that all scenes in the screenplay contribute to the overall narrative in a meaningful way
- Craft dialogue that is impactful and engaging while avoiding cliches or excessive exposition
- Physical environment: The physical environment in the screenplay is diverse, ranging from a peaceful summer cottage to a gritty car wash and a bustling airport. The settings include suburban neighborhoods, a small town, a motel, a fairground, and various modes of transportation such as buses, airplanes, and cars. The contrasting environments create a sense of tension and juxtaposition, highlighting the characters' emotional states and experiences.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay revolve around family dynamics, community, and personal relationships. The characters are deeply connected to their families and communities, often interacting in shared spaces such as fairgrounds, school buses, and porches. The small-town setting fosters a strong sense of community, where everyone knows each other and supports one another. Music and literature also play a significant role in the cultural landscape, reflecting the characters' emotions and experiences.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is that of a close-knit small town, where people rely on each other for support and assistance. The town has a legal system in place, with lawyers and depositions playing a significant role in the narrative. The societal norms and values are rooted in trust, mutual understanding, and interconnectedness. However, the screenplay also explores the darker side of society, such as broken families, addiction, and the aftermath of a tragic accident.
- Technology: The technological elements in the screenplay are relatively minimal, focusing mainly on communication tools such as phones, cordless phones, and computers. These tools serve as a means of connecting with others, but also highlight the characters' emotional distance and disconnect. The use of modern technology contrasts with the traditional and nostalgic setting, emphasizing the characters' struggles to navigate their complex emotions and relationships.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions in various ways. The contrasting settings create a sense of tension and juxtaposition, highlighting the characters' emotional states and experiences. The cultural elements of family dynamics and community foster a strong sense of connection and support, while the societal structure emphasizes trust, mutual understanding, and interconnectedness. The minimal technological elements highlight the characters' emotional distance and disconnect, contributing to their struggles to navigate their complex emotions and relationships.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay by creating a sense of tension and juxtaposition, emphasizing the characters' emotional states and experiences. The contrasting settings, cultural elements, societal structure, and minimal technological elements all serve to advance the plot and deepen the narrative, highlighting the characters' struggles and triumphs in the face of adversity.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements also contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of family, community, addiction, loss, and the aftermath of tragedy. The contrasting settings, cultural elements, societal structure, and minimal technological elements all serve to deepen the narrative and add thematic depth, emphasizing the characters' emotional journeys and the complexities of human relationships.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by its blend of intimate character moments and stark urban imagery, which creates a sense of contrast and tension. The dialogue is sparse but impactful, conveying emotion and atmosphere through subtle interactions. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by enhancing the mood and theme of the scenes, emphasizing the contrast between personal relationships and external challenges, creating a sense of depth and complexity. |
Best Representation Scene | 1 - A Morning at the Cottage and an Uneasy Night in the City |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it effectively blends intimate family moments with urban grit, showcasing the writer's ability to create depth and tension through contrasting elements. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Emotional Impact and Dialogue | There is a strong positive correlation between the Emotional Impact and Dialogue of a scene. When the dialogue is stronger, the emotional impact of the scene tends to be higher as well. This suggests that focusing on improving the dialogue could enhance the emotional impact of the story. |
Tone and Emotional Impact | There is a positive correlation between the Tone and Emotional Impact of a scene. Scenes with more intense tones (such as 'Tense', 'Intense', 'Serious') tend to have a higher emotional impact. The author might consider using more intense tones to increase the emotional engagement of the audience. |
Character Changes and Move Story Forward | There is a strong positive correlation between Character Changes and Move Story Forward. This suggests that when the characters undergo changes, the story progresses. The author should focus on character development to ensure the story is engaging and moving forward. |
High Stakes and Conflict | There is a moderate positive correlation between High Stakes and Conflict. Scenes with higher stakes tend to have more conflict, which can increase the tension and engagement of the audience. The author might consider raising the stakes to intensify the conflicts in the story. |
Concept and Overall Grade | There is a moderate positive correlation between Concept and Overall Grade. This suggests that a stronger concept can lead to a higher overall grade for the scene. The author should focus on developing unique and engaging concepts for each scene. |
Outlier Scene | Scene 8 has a significantly lower score in Move Story Forward, Conflict, and Emotional Impact compared to other scenes. The author might want to reconsider the elements of this scene to ensure it contributes to the overall progression, tension, and emotional engagement of the story. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases strong emotional depth, character development, and thematic exploration throughout the scenes. The writer demonstrates a unique voice and a talent for creating nuanced characters and engaging conflicts. However, there is room for improvement in pacing, dialogue, and scene structure to enhance the overall impact of the screenplay.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Save the Cat by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into structuring scenes, developing characters, and creating engaging dialogue. Applying these principles can help improve pacing, character development, and overall storytelling in the screenplay. |
Exercise | Write a scene without dialogue, focusing on visual storytelling and character emotions.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will help the writer develop their skills in conveying emotions and relationships through visual cues and character actions, enhancing the depth and impact of their storytelling. |
Screenplay | The Social Network by Aaron Sorkin | Studying this screenplay will help the writer improve dialogue skills, create engaging character relationships, and build suspense through dialogue and pacing. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Hero's Journey | Mitchell Stehens, the main character, embarks on a journey to seek justice for a bus accident that killed several children, including his daughter's friends. He faces various challenges and meets new people along the way. | The Hero's Journey is a common narrative arc in literature and film, where the main character goes on a journey, faces challenges, and returns transformed. Examples include Star Wars, The Lord of the Rings, and The Lion King. |
Tragedy | The story revolves around a tragic bus accident that kills several children and leaves others injured, causing emotional distress and trauma for the families and community. | Tragedy is a genre of storytelling that explores serious or somber themes, often involving loss, suffering, and emotional pain. Examples include Romeo and Juliet, Titanic, and The Pursuit of Happyness. |
The Grieving Parent | Several parents in the story, including Mitchell and Billy, experience grief and loss after the death of their children in the bus accident. | The Grieving Parent is a common trope in stories that explore themes of loss and tragedy. Examples include A Walk to Remember, The Fault in Our Stars, and The Lovely Bones. |
The Lawyer | Mitchell Stehens is a lawyer who represents the families of the children killed in the bus accident, seeking justice and compensation for their loss. | The Lawyer is a common trope in stories that explore themes of justice, morality, and ethics. Examples include A Few Good Men, Erin Brockovich, and Legally Blonde. |
The Outsider | Mitchell Stehens is an outsider who comes to the small town to investigate the bus accident, causing tension and suspicion among the locals. | The Outsider is a common trope in stories that explore themes of community, identity, and belonging. Examples include The Outsiders, To Kill a Mockingbird, and The Secret Life of Bees. |
Redemption | Mitchell Stehens seeks redemption for his past failures as a father, trying to help his drug-addict daughter and seeking justice for the families affected by the bus accident. | Redemption is a common theme in stories that explore themes of morality, ethics, and personal growth. Examples include A Christmas Carol, The Shawshank Redemption, and The Pursuit of Happyness. |
The Damsel in Distress | Nicole Burnell, a hospital patient, is a young girl who becomes the center of a legal battle for compensation after the bus accident. | The Damsel in Distress is a common trope in stories that explore themes of rescue, protection, and chivalry. Examples include Sleeping Beauty, Beauty and the Beast, and Cinderella. |
The Mentor | Mitchell Stehens acts as a mentor to Nicole Burnell, helping her navigate the legal system and cope with her disability. | The Mentor is a common trope in stories that explore themes of personal growth, learning, and self-discovery. Examples include Star Wars, The Karate Kid, and The Matrix. |
The Tragic Hero | Mitchell Stehens is a tragic hero who seeks justice for the bus accident but faces personal and professional challenges along the way. | The Tragic Hero is a common trope in stories that explore themes of morality, ethics, and personal growth. Examples include Hamlet, Macbeth, and Othello. |
The Unreliable Narrator | The story is told from multiple perspectives, including Mitchell Stehens, who may not be a reliable narrator due to his personal biases and motivations. | The Unreliable Narrator is a common trope in stories that explore themes of perspective, subjectivity, and truth. Examples include The Usual Suspects, Fight Club, and Gone Girl. |
Memorable lines in the script:
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22 | Mitchell: Every time I get on one of these flights to rescue Zoe, I remember the summer we almost lost her. |
18 | Nicole: It just seems...kind of weird. |
19 | Nicole: Once more he stept into the street, And to his lips again Laid his long pipe of smooth straight cane; And ere he blew three notes such sweet soft notes as yet musician's cunning Never gave the enraptured air - There was a rustling, seemed like a bustling Of merry crowds justling at pitching and hustling, Small feet were pattering, wooden shoes clattering, Little hands clapping and little tongues chattering, And, like fowls in a farm-yard when the barley is scattering, Out came the children running. All the little boys and girls, With rosy cheeks and flaxen curls, And sparkling eyes and teeth like pearls. Tripping and skipping, ran merrily after The wonderful music with shouting and laughter... |
35 | Dolores: I remember wrenching the steering wheel to the right and slapping my foot against the brake petal. I wasn't the driver anymore. |
26 | DOLORES: The true jury of a person's peers is the people of her town. Only they, the people who have known her all her life, and not twelve strangers, can decide her guilt or innocence. |
Some Loglines to consider:
After a tragic school bus accident devastates a small town, a lawyer arrives to help the grieving families find justice, but soon uncovers secrets that will forever change their lives. |
In the aftermath of a horrific accident, a group of parents grapple with grief, guilt, and the search for meaning, while a mysterious lawyer attempts to unravel the truth. |
A young girl who survives a school bus accident becomes the key witness in a legal battle, but her testimony will have devastating consequences for her family and her community. |
As a small town struggles to heal from a devastating loss, a web of secrets and lies is exposed, forcing the residents to confront their own culpability and the fragility of life. |
The Sweet Hereafter is a haunting exploration of grief, guilt, and the search for redemption in the face of unimaginable loss. |
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Explanation: The Sweet Hereafter is a powerful and thought-provoking screenplay that explores the aftermath of a tragic accident on a small town. Its strengths lie in its complex characters, realistic dialogue, and evocative visual imagery. However, the pacing can be slow at times and the ending may leave some viewers wanting more closure. Overall, it is a compelling and well-crafted story that would appeal to audiences interested in character-driven dramas with a focus on human resilience in the face of tragedy.