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1 EXT/INT. GEORGIAN HOUSE, MAYFAIR - BEDROOM - DAY 1 ESTABLISH an elegant Mayfair townhouse, horse carriages pass by and well heeled couples stroll. We CUT INSIDE TO THE BEDROOM: Edward Marshall Hall - known simply as MARSHALL (24) - is
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2 INT HANSOM CAB-EXT. NEWGATE JAIL - DAY 2 Marshall rides in a Hansom as it approaches Newgate Jail. London streets bustling with activity. A man CHARLIE GILL (34) waits outside the jail gates reading a newspaper. Close on the headline: RIVER MURDERS. ANOTHER
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5 INT. NEWGATE JAIL - UNDERGROUND PASSAGEWAYS - DAY 5 Gill covers his nose with a handkerchief as they follow the lamplight held by the guard. Keys jangle and prisoners scream and shout in a cacophony forged in purgatory.
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7 INT. NEWGATE HANGING ROOM - DAY 7 Marshall stops in his tracks as the harrowed face of the CONDEMNED WOMAN (early 20’s) makes eye contact with him. She could be the twin sister of Lillie Langtree. The same wide eyed expression. Her full lips and luxuriant hair
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8 EXT. EMBANKMENT PIER - CUSTOMS POST - NIGHT 8 We are high above the moonlit Thames bisecting the city like a silver ribbon. Ships bob at anchor as we descend towards the customs pier on the Embankment near Blackfriars. A uniformed customs officer BILLY SNEDDON (mid 30's) is
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16 INT/EXT. EMBANKMENT PIER - SECOND CARRIAGE - NIGHT 16 Doctor GILES SCYTH (40's), takes another sip from his hip flask before hauling his rotund frame down from the carriage. 17 EXT. CORMORANT SAILING SHIP - DECK - NIGHT 17 The wet deck of Cormorant is illuminated as the teenagers
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24 EXT. EMBANKMENT PIER - IMMIGRATION HUT - NIGHT 24 MOMENTS LATER: Billy Sneddon checks the papers of Veronique and Henri Dubois. They are in order. BILLY SNEDDON
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25 EXT. EMBANKMENT QUAYSIDE - NIGHT 25 SUDDENLY the air is riven by the sound of POLICE WHISTLES and POLICE BOOTS crashing on cobbles. Abberline and Cunningham appear above the scene looking down. TWENTY POLICEMEN make their presence known.
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27 EXT. HOUSES OF PARLIAMENT – NIGHT - AERIAL SHOT 27 The illuminated Parliament Buildings reflect off the Thames, rippled by a passing steamship heading east. LORDS SPEAKER (O/S) We now begin the committee scrutiny
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30 INT. HOUSE OF LORDS, COMMITTEE CHAMBER – EVENING 30 LORD SOMERSET is now standing addressing questions to LORD LABOUCHERE, making a big show of his interest. LORD SOMERSET By trafficking you mean shipping
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31 INT. WILTONS MUSIC HALL - NIGHT 31 Behind the bar is Landlady MAGGIE CROSS (30's), a fiery Irish redhead, at home serving the rowdy customers. We track with her as she navigates the crowd carrying a drink on a tray. The bar is full of SAILORS in naval uniform. A customer at
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35 INT. WILTONS MUSIC HALL - TAP ROOM - NIGHT 35 BILLY SNEDDON hurries in through the entrance door searching for Sarah. Maggie spots Billy. He is white and sweating.. MAGGIE CROSS
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38 INT. BLACKFRIARS BOXING GYM – DAY 38 MARSHALL spars with LORD NORTHCLIFFE, trading sharp blows. Northcliffe lands body shots, but Marshall dances away. MARSHALL Hit, Alfred. Don’t get hit.
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40 EXT. THE THAMES EMBANKMENT - DAY 40 A carriage heads past moored ships and sailors buying supplies from street vendors. 41 INT/EXT. CARRIAGE - THAMES EMBANKMENT- DAY 41 The carriage has pulled up next to an ironclad warship the
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42 INT. OLD BAILEY - ROBING ROOM - DAY 42 NEWTON AND LAWLESS enter to see... Marshall and Charlie Gill getting into their battle dress CHARLIE GILL Arthur you vagabond. How are you?
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43 INT. OLD BAILEY - COUNSELS BENCHES - DAY. 43 Marshall and Gill sit amongst other barristers and prepare for the start of Crown -v- Rosenberg. Rosenberg is already in the dock when the Jury file in. The Jury are visibly hostile when they see by his attire and
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46 INT. OLD BAILEY - COURT ROOM. DAY 46 EDWARD CARSON rushes into court theatrically late. He hurries to counsel's table and bows to the Judge. JUDGE PEACH Are you Counsel in Rosenberg?
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47 INT. OLD BAILEY - PUBLIC GALLERY. DAY 47 Newton gives a confident nod to Lawless. He appears impressed despite the outcome. ARTHUR NEWTON To business. What is the fee for
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49 INT. THE GEORGE PUBLIC HOUSE - NIGHT 49 If the Old Bailey is the centre of the criminal world by day then, The George holds that accolade by night. A smoke-filled haven of barristers, solicitors, criminals, prostitutes, reporters, clerks, fraudsters, Aristocrats and Judges.
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50 EXT/INT. MIDDLE TEMPLE HALL - NIGHT 50 Gowned Barristers walk forward in groups of four past uniformed servants and into Great Hall, laid out for dinner in one hundred “messes” of four. Marshall sits in a mess with Charlie Gill, MONTAGUE DRUIT
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51 INT. 3 DR JOHNSON BUILDINGS - CLERKS ROOM - MORNING 51 The hushed chatter is audible as Marshall enters the chaos of a Barrister’s Clerks room first thing in the morning. BERNIE LAWLESS I have a GBH for Mr Colton.
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54 INT. NEWGATE JAIL - CELL - DAY 54 Marshall and Newton enter. Sarah is crying. Her eye is swollen and her lip is cut ARTHUR NEWTON (INAPPROPRIATELY LOUD) Mrs. Sneddon, this is Marshall. He
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55 EXT. THE EMBANKMENT PIER - DAY 55 Marshall and Gill walk in awkward silence. MARSHALL What do you think of Newton? They pass HMS Polyphemus in the line of moored vessels.
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57 INT. THE GEORGE PUBLIC HOUSE - DAY 57 Marshall arrives at The George as Lilly Fortune is interviewing Inspector Abberline for an article. Lilly looks over and indicates to Marshall to join them. LILLY FORTUNE
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60 EXT. LINCOLN'S INN - WALLED GARDENS - DAY 60 Marshall and Alfred are having a picnic lunch in the spectacular gardens of Lincoln's Inn. Alfred is reading the pathologist's report as he juggles game pie, cherry tomatoes and pickled onions on his plate.
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61 EXT. OLD BAILEY- DAY 61 The streets are full of people and traffic coming to the opening day of what the Daily Sketch is calling “The Music Hall Double Homicide”. Newspaper boys have brisk trade and there is already a queue
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63 INT. OLD BAILEY- ROBING ROOM - DAY 63 Marshall and Gill are changing into Barristerial attire, when Bernie Lawless enters, carrying volumes of legal texts. BERNIE LAWLESS Good morning gentlemen. Now, let me
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66 INT. OLD BAILEY - COURTROOM - DAY 66 Marshall enters court, sees Lilly on the press benches, smiles, then sits. Lilly smiles back, discreetly points to his un-attached collar, which he quickly rectifies.
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67 INT. OLD BAILEY - COURT ROOM - PRESS BENCHES. DAY 67 Xing Fu sketches Peach in pastel shades of plums. She shows it to Lilly. It is an accurate likeness. LILLY FORTUNE It’s almost photography.
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70 EXT. BLACKFRIARS BRIDGE - NIGHT 70 Through the mist, we hear the whistle of a train crossing the adjacent Blackfriars railway bridge. A PRETTY BLONDE greets the curb crawling carriage. Her name is EMILY HOWE. She is fifteen.
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73 EXT. OLD BAILEY - DAY 73 Marshall, Lilly, Xing and Gill emerge from the court. CHARLIE GILL That was inspired, Marshall. MARSHALL
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77 INT. WOOLWICH ARSENAL, ARMAMENT FACTORY. NIGHT 77 CIVILIAN WORKERS fashion brass into artillery shell casings which are carefully placed onto horse-drawn wagons. The SUPERVISOR inspects one of the casings and seems happy. SUPERVISOR
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82 EXT. PATH - RIVER THAMES - NIGHT 82 Marshall and Xing stand facing each at the parapet. MARSHALL I would like to take you home. XING
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85 EXT. DAILY SKETCH, PRINTING PRESS FACILITY. DAWN 85 Wet cobbles reflect faint light as a carriage halts. O/S – The printing presses whine in the distance. Xing Fu steps out carrying an EASTMAN CAMERA. The DRIVER hands her a gunpowder flashlamp.
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91 INT. BLACKFRIARS BOXING GYM – DAY 91 MARSHALL spars with LORD NORTHCLIFFE, trading sharp blows. Northcliffe lands body shots, but Marshall is ether. MARSHALL How are Lilly and Xing getting on
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98 INT. OLD BAILEY - ROBING ROOM - DAY 98 Marshall, Newton, Gill, and Lawless take advantage of the early hour and space. CHARLIE GILL If we say the fight began because
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100 EXT. OYSTER BAR - BOROUGH MARKET - DAY 100 Oysters on the half shell are presented over an ice bucket. Lilly picks up an oyster, places chopped shallot and lemon juice onto it and lets it slide into her mouth. LILLY FORTUNE
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101 INT. BLACKFRIARS MORTUARY - DAY 101 INSPECTOR ABBERLINE What are you saying Doctor? Piper removes his mask to speak. He points at the Thames girl’s body.
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102 INT. THE OLD BAILEY COURT ROOM - DAY 102 Wilton's landlord Jimmy Cross is in the witness box. EDWARD CARSON Lets be honest. The Naval Officers insulted Sarah and you handed Billy
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105 INT. WILTONS MUSIC HALL - FIREPLACE. NIGHT 105 JIMMY CROSS (O.S.) To begin with, the officers were just crude...but then.... LIEUTENANT BROWN
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109 INT. THE GEORGE PUBLIC HOUSE - NIGHT 109 Marshall and Lilly Fortune are having dinner when Abberline arrives. MARSHALL Have you eaten inspector?
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110 INT. OLD BAILEY - COURTROOM - DAY 110 Ashraf Singh has called Billy Sneddon to give evidence. BILLY SNEDDON To tell the truth, so help me God. ASHRAF SINGH
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111 INT. OLD BAILEY COURT ROOM - PUBLIC GALLEY. DAY 111 Abberline is approached by POLICE CONSTABLE DICKENS who has clearly been running. PC DICKENS There’s been another one sir.
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115 INT. CORMORANT BRIDGE - NIGHT 115 Mathurin has his feet on the map desk and is snoring loudly. Marshall and Lilly slowly open the door of the bridge. They look around the cabin and discreetly open draws containing maps and charts. Nothing helpful.
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124 EXT. OLD BAILEY. DAY 124 Newspaper boys peddle their wares with the mortuary photograph of Veronique on the front page. NEWSPAPER BOY Police name murder victim.
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127 EXT. THE CORMORANT - ATLANTIC OCEAN - UPPER DECK - DAY 127 The sun shines onto the deck of the Cormorant as it is scrubbed by TWENTY TEENAGERS including Sarah. SARAH SNEDDON The voyage took many weeks.
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130 EXT. THE CORMORANT - GANGPLANK - NIGHT 130 From Sarah's POV we make it to dry land. 131 EXT. EMBANKMENT PIER - NIGHT 131 LORD SOMERSET Doctor Scythee, prepare to inspect
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134 EXT. FLEUR DE LIS, CLEVELAND STREET - NIGHT 134 A DOORMAN opens the carriage door and Lord Somerset jumps down. He holds out his hand for Sarah who follows. Sarah stands in awe of the beautifully lit, Regency building. SARAH SNEDDON
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139 INT. OLD BAILEY COURT ROOM - PRESS BENCHES. DAY 139 Lilly Fortune shows empathy and mouths “well done” to Sarah who holds her head high. XING FU Walking a mile in her steps...
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141 INT. NEWGATE JAIL - CELLS. NIGHT 141 Marshall and Abberline enter the cell. BILLY SNEDDON I saw this photograph in the paper. What happened to Sarah happened to
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142 EXT. DAILY SKETCH NEWSPAPER - FLEET STREET - NIGHT 142 The hustle and bustle of Fleet Street, the epicentre of the newspaper world. 143 INT. DAILY SKETCH NEWSROOM - NIGHT 143 Lilly Fortune and Xing are assembling tomorrow's front page.
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145 INT. OLD BAILEY - COURTROOM - DAY 145 Judge Peach addresses counsel and he is impatient. JUDGE PEACH Have counsel had the chance to discuss a plea agreement?
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146 INT. OLD BAILEY - PUBLIC GALLERY - DAY 146 Sir Forest Fulton takes a seat next to Arthur Newton. SIR FOREST FULTON QC Arthur, who looks after Marshall? ARTHUR NEWTON
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148 EXT. OLD BAILEY - DAY 148 Marshall, Lilly Fortune, and Arthur Newton have their backs to the walls of the famous court building and say nothing. Marshall lights a cigar. LILLY FORTUNE
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150 EXT. STREET - LONDON - DAY 150 Outside The old Bailey FOUR NEWSPAPER BOYS have hundreds of newspapers and have set up both front pages we saw earlier: They tear down the advertisement for the headline "Double Hanging of Navy Killers" and promote the other which says,
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152 EXT. THE GEORGE PUBLIC HOUSE - NIGHT 152 Marshall approaches Charlie Gill in The George. MARSHALL I have an apology to make but not without a drink in my hand.
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153 EXT/INT. NEWGATE JAIL - CELL - NIGHT 153 Billy Sneddon sits in the gloom, alone with his thoughts. Marshall and a wigged BARRISTER enter. Marshall gives the guard a shilling to leave them alone. BILLY SNEDDON
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156 INT. NEWGATE JAIL - HANGING ROOM - DAY 156 Marshall and Lilly enter the hanging room with the warder. They watch as TWO GUARDS bring out Billy Sneddon. A PRIEST steps forward. PRIEST
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159 INT. COUNTRY COTTAGE, ESSEX. DAY 159 Other than a lick of paint it is perfect. Sarah turns to the children. SARAH SNEDDON This is a gift from Daddy to us.
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160 EXT. WESTMINSTER HALL. EVENING 160 The carriage arrives at a reception which Lilly and Xing are attending. Uniformed butlers attend to the beautifully dressed guests as they arrive in grand style.

Marshall Full Pilot

In late 19th century Britain, a principled barrister must navigate the political machinations of the legal system as he defends a couple accused of murder, uncovering a web of corruption and injustice that threatens to tear apart the fabric of society.

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Marshall offers a unique blend of legal procedural drama, historical mystery, and social commentary, set against the backdrop of Victorian London's vibrant and morally ambiguous society. The protagonist, a sharp-witted lawyer with a strong moral code, tackles complex cases while battling personal demons and societal injustices. The compelling mystery surrounding the river murders and the white slave trade, interwoven with the courtroom dramas, creates a narrative rich in suspense and intrigue, attracting viewers interested in historical fiction, legal thrillers, and character-driven stories.

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Genres:
Drama 50% Crime 40% Thriller 30% Romance 25% Action 20% Comedy 10%

Setting: Late 19th century (Victorian era), London, primarily in areas such as Mayfair, Newgate Jail, the Old Bailey, and various public houses.

Themes: Justice and Injustice, Social Injustice and Inequality, Personal Sacrifice and Moral Ambiguity, Love and Relationships, Political Intrigue and Corruption

Conflict & Stakes: The central conflict revolves around the legal battles faced by Billy and Sarah Sneddon, who are accused of murder amidst societal prejudices and personal traumas, with their lives and reputations at stake.

Mood: Tense and dramatic, with moments of somber reflection and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The intertwining of personal stories with significant historical events, highlighting the struggles of marginalized individuals in a rigid legal system.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Sarah's traumatic past and its impact on her actions during the trial, which adds depth to her character and the overall narrative.
  • Distinctive Setting: The use of historical locations in London, such as Newgate Jail and the Old Bailey, which adds authenticity and richness to the story.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of societal prejudices and the moral dilemmas faced by legal professionals in a historical context.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast that includes strong female characters and complex male leads, each with their own struggles and motivations.

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