The shining
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Promo
USP: This script offers a fresh and chilling take on the haunted hotel genre, with a unique blend of psychological horror, supernatural elements, and family drama. The characters are authentic and relatable, brought to life through naturalistic dialogue and nuanced performances. The Overlook Hotel is not just a backdrop, but a character in its own right, with a dark and tragic history that seeps into the present. The innovative storytelling techniques, including the use of Danny's 'shining' ability, add depth and intrigue to the narrative. This script is a compelling and original piece of storytelling that will keep audiences on the edge of their seats.
Overview
Genres: Horror, Drama, Thriller, Psychological Thriller, Mystery, Psychological Horror, Psychological
Setting: Present day, The Overlook Hotel, a grand but isolated hotel located in the Colorado Rockies, and Boulder, USA.
Overview: The screenplay for 'The Shining' demonstrates strong character development, effective use of dialogue, and a unique exploration of psychological tension and human nature. While there are areas for improvement, the screenplay has a solid foundation with significant potential for impact.
Themes: Isolation and Confinement, Family Dynamics and Relationships, Supernatural and the Occult
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflict is between Jack and the hotel's malevolent forces, which threaten to drive him insane and harm his family. The stakes are high, as Jack's mental health, his family's safety, and their very lives are at risk.
Overall Mood: Psychological horror and suspense
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21, 22, 23, 24, 25, 26, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 34, 35, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40, 41, 42, 43, 44, 45, 46, 47, 48, 49, 50, 51, 52, 53, 54, 55, 56, 57, 58, 59, 60, 61, 62, 63, 64, 65, 66, 67, 68, 69, 70, 71, 72, 73, 74, 75, 76, 77, 78, 79, 80, 81, 82, 83, 84, 85, 86, 87, 88, 89, 90, 91, 92, 93, 94, 95, 96, 97, 98, 99, 100: Psychological horror and suspense, with a growing sense of unease and danger as the hotel's malevolent forces threaten to drive Jack insane and harm his family.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: A fresh take on a classic horror story, with updated visuals and a modern audience in mind.
- Plot Twist : The hotel's malevolent forces threaten to drive Jack insane and harm his family, adding a layer of psychological tension to the supernatural elements.
- Distinctive Setting : The isolated and grand Overlook Hotel, with its dark past and supernatural presence.
Comparable Scripts:
- The Shining by Stephen King (book)
- The Shining (1980) directed by Stanley Kubrick
- Doctor Sleep (2019) directed by Mike Flanagan
- The Haunting of Hill House (novel and series)
- 1408 (2007) directed by Mikael Håfström
- The Amityville Horror (1979) directed by Stuart Rosenberg
- The Innocents (1961) directed by Jack Clayton
- The Turn of the Screw (novella and various adaptations)
- The Changeling (1980) directed by Peter Medak
- The Legend of Hell House (1973) directed by John Hough
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$20-30 million
Target Audience Demographics: Young adults and adults aged 18-49, fans of horror and psychological thrillers.
Marketability: The Shining is a classic horror novel and film, and this screenplay offers a fresh take on the story with updated visuals and a modern audience in mind. The supernatural elements and psychological tension are sure to attract horror fans, while the family drama and character development will appeal to a wider audience.
The horror genre can be hit or miss at the box office, and this screenplay may not appeal to audiences outside of the genre. However, the strong character development and themes of addiction and isolation could attract a wider audience.
The Shining has a cult following, and this screenplay offers a new interpretation of the story that could appeal to fans of the original. The supernatural elements and psychological tension are sure to attract horror fans, while the family drama and character development will appeal to a wider audience.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, depending on the success of the film at the box office and in home media sales.
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
- Originality (92nd percentile) - The screenplay demonstrates unique and fresh ideas.
- Engagement (82nd percentile) - The story is compelling and captures the reader's interest.
- Emotional Impact (59th percentile) - The script effectively evokes emotions in the audience.
- Plot (21st percentile) - The story structure and pacing could be strengthened to enhance the overall narrative flow.
- Formatting (0th percentile) - Ensure the script adheres to standard formatting rules for improved readability.
- Predictability (24th percentile) - Introduce more unexpected elements to keep the audience engaged and surprised.
The writer's style appears to be more intuitive, with strong dialogue and character development, but could benefit from focusing on concept and plot elements.
Balancing Elements- Develop a more balanced approach to storytelling by focusing on both character development and plot structure.
- Improve formatting to ensure the script is easily readable and adheres to industry standards.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has a unique concept and engaging characters, but it requires refinement in plot structure, formatting, and predictability to reach its full potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Script Structure | 8.50 | 88 | The Umbrella Academy: 8.25 | the dark knight rises: 8.50 |
Script Characters | 8.50 | 73 | The Umbrella Academy: 8.25 | Titanic: 8.50 |
Script Theme | 8.50 | 72 | The Umbrella Academy: 8.25 | Titanic: 8.50 |
Script Premise | 8.50 | 69 | The Umbrella Academy: 8.25 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.50 |
Script Conflict | 7.75 | 51 | Inception: 7.50 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.75 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.4 | 44 | The Umbrella Academy: 7.3 | True Blood: 7.4 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.6 | 43 | Coco: 7.5 | the boys (TV): 7.6 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 7.6 | 42 | Fleabag: 7.5 | True Blood: 7.6 |
Scene Pacing | 8.24 | 39 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.23 | The shining: 8.24 |
Scene Concept | 8.0 | 38 | Poor Things: 7.9 | a few good men: 8.0 |
Overall Script | 8.00 | 38 | Mo: 7.90 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.4 | 37 | Hot Fuzz: 7.3 | Vice: 7.4 |
Scene Character Changes | 6.6 | 36 | Fleabag: 6.5 | glass Onion Knives Out : 6.6 |
Scene Overall | 8.2 | 34 | Almost Famous: 8.1 | a few good men: 8.2 |
Scene Plot | 7.7 | 34 | Hot Fuzz: 7.6 | fight Club: 7.7 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.7 | 27 | Poor Things: 7.6 | groundhog day: 7.7 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.29 | 26 | Coco: 7.28 | The shining: 7.29 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 26 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Script Originality | 8.00 | 25 | Midsommar: 7.75 | True Blood: 8.00 |
Scene Characters | 8.0 | 23 | Narcos Pilot: 7.9 | Knives Out: 8.0 |
Scene Engagement | 8.83 | 23 | Swingers: 8.82 | Thor: 8.83 |
Scene Originality | 8.29 | 23 | El Mariachi: 8.26 | The shining: 8.29 |
Scene External Goal | 7.05 | 19 | Killers of the flower moon: 7.04 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.05 |
Script Emotional Impact | 7.25 | 14 | Charlie and The Choclate Factory: 7.00 | True Blood: 7.25 |
Script Visual Impact | 7.25 | 13 | Breaking bad, episode 306: 7.00 | There's something about Mary: 7.25 |
Script Structure | 7.95 | 2 | Wild Wild West: 7.93 | The shining: 7.95 |
Scene Formatting | 7.76 | 2 | Battlefield Earth: 7.74 | Catch me if you can: 7.76 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice in the screenplay is characterized by a blend of natural dialogue, detailed descriptions, and a sense of realism. The writer effectively captures the essence of the characters and their interactions, creating a palpable and immersive atmosphere throughout the narrative.
Best representation: Scene 1 - Danny's Reluctance to Move to the Overlook Hotel. Scene 1 best showcases the author's unique voice through its concise and realistic dialogue, detailed scene descriptions, and smooth transitions between locations. The scene effectively introduces the main characters and establishes the professional and polite atmosphere of the hotel interview, setting the tone for the rest of the screenplay.
Memorable Lines:
- Jack: All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. (Scene 46)
- Jack: Here's Johnny! (Scene 38)
- Danny: Red Rum. Red Rum. Red Rum. (Scene 36)
- Jack: They had to, in order to survive. (Scene 7)
- Jack: I'm not going to hurt you... I'm just going to bash your brains in! I'm going to bash them right the fuck in. (Scene 32)
Writing Style:
The writing style in this screenplay can be characterized as a blend of psychological horror, suspenseful tension, and complex character dynamics, with a strong emphasis on atmospheric settings and power struggles.
Style Similarities:
- Stephen King
- Alfred Hitchcock
- Stanley Kubrick
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Consider
Executive Summary
The Shining screenplay is a chilling and atmospheric horror story with strong performances and effective use of suspense. However, it suffers from pacing issues and underdeveloped characters, particularly Wendy. Further exploration of the supernatural elements and the hotel's backstory could enhance the narrative.
- Masterful use of suspense and atmosphere, particularly through visual storytelling and Kubrick's iconic directing style. high
- Jack Torrance's descent into madness is both disturbing and compelling, with Nicholson's performance elevating the character. high
- The isolated and eerie setting of the Overlook Hotel is effectively established and utilized to create a sense of unease and dread. high ( Scene 1 Scene 7 Scene 14 Scene 23 )
- Danny's psychic abilities ('the shining') add a unique and intriguing layer to the story, enhancing the supernatural elements. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 15 Scene 18 Scene 32 )
- The gradual reveal of the hotel's dark history and the tragedy of the Grady family adds depth and intrigue to the narrative. medium ( Scene 3 Scene 9 Scene 11 Scene 12 )
- Wendy Torrance's character could be further developed beyond the 'damsel in distress' archetype. high
- The pacing can be slow at times, particularly in the first half of the screenplay. medium
- The ending, while visually striking, might leave some viewers wanting more closure or explanation. medium
- Some scenes depicting daily life at the hotel could be trimmed or tightened to improve the overall pacing. low ( Scene 14 Scene 16 Scene 19 )
- Jack's interactions with Lloyd and Grady, while intriguing, could be further explored to clarify their roles and motivations. low ( Scene 22 Scene 27 )
- A deeper exploration of the supernatural forces at work in the hotel and their connection to Danny's abilities could enrich the story's mythology. medium
- More backstory on Jack's alcoholism and its impact on the family could provide additional context for his character arc. low
- The nature of the threat in Room 237 could be more explicitly defined, leaving less ambiguity for interpretation. low ( Scene 24 Scene 37 Scene 38 )
- The screenplay deviates significantly from Stephen King's novel, offering a unique interpretation of the source material. high
- The 'All work and no play...' scene is a memorable and unsettling portrayal of Jack's deteriorating mental state. high ( Scene 30 )
- The use of ambiguity and open-ended questions leaves room for multiple interpretations and adds to the film's mystique. medium ( Scene 3 Scene 22 Scene 27 )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 8.5, The screenplay presents a compelling premise with a strong foundation for audience engagement. The concept of a family's isolation in a haunted hotel, their psychological struggles, and the exploration of psychic abilities taps into universal fears and curiosities. While the premise effectively establishes the central conflict and the eerie atmosphere, there are areas where it could be refined to further enhance its originality and narrative potential. See More
Structure: 8.5, The screenplay exhibits a well-structured plot and effective use of narrative elements to build tension and drive the story forward. While the pacing could be improved in certain sections, the overall structure effectively supports the character arcs and themes. See More
Theme: 8.5, The screenplay effectively explores and conveys its themes and messages, utilizing various narrative elements to develop and reinforce them. While some aspects could be further refined, the screenplay overall successfully engages the audience with its exploration of isolation, madness, and the power of the mind. See More
Visual Impact: 7.25, The screenplay exhibits considerable strengths in its visual imagery, particularly in its vivid depictions of the Overlook Hotel and its haunting atmosphere. The scenes set in the ballroom and the maze are particularly noteworthy, showcasing a blend of eerie beauty and unsettling tension. The transformation of Jack from a struggling writer to a menacing figure is captured effectively, with the use of close-ups and lighting adding to the character's psychological decay. Overall, the screenplay provides a solid foundation for visual storytelling, with opportunities to further enhance its effectiveness and originality. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.25, The screenplay effectively establishes an unsettling atmosphere and tension through its exploration of isolation, fear, and psychological deterioration. While the emotional depth could be enhanced by developing the characters' motivations and inner conflicts, the screenplay has the potential to leave a lasting impact on the audience with its evocative language and disturbing imagery. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes, creating a suspenseful and engaging narrative. However, there are opportunities to enhance the emotional impact and narrative tension by refining the clarity of conflicts, escalating the stakes, and exploring deeper resolutions. See More
Originality: 8.00, Demonstrates innovation through its exploration of the horror film genre, emphasizing psychological tension and exploring the depths of human nature as it grapples with isolation, madness, and the supernatural. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- The scene opens with a series of shots of a car journey leading to the Overlook Hotel. Jack Torrance, the protagonist, arrives for a job interview with Mr. Ullman, the hotel manager, and his secretary. The setting is the hotel's grand lobby, and the tone is professional and polite. The dialogue consists of small talk and questions about Jack's background and qualifications. The scene ends with Jack and Ullman discussing the job offer as the camera tracks in on the hotel.
- The scene takes place in Jack and Wendy's apartment and features Danny, Wendy, and Danny's imaginary friend Tony. Danny expresses his concerns about moving to the Overlook Hotel for the winter, and Wendy tries to reassure him and engage with Tony. The tone is calm and reassuring, with a hint of apprehension from Danny. The scene ends with Wendy trying to reassure Danny and Tony that they will all have a good time at the hotel.
- In this scene, Jack meets the hotel manager, Ullman, and caretaker, Watson, at the Overlook Hotel. Ullman offers Jack the winter caretaker job, and Watson will show Jack around. Jack mentions being a writer, and Ullman shares the hotel's history, including a past tragedy where the caretaker killed his family. The scene is professional, informative, and foreshadows potential conflicts.
- In the Boulder apartment, Danny, while washing hands, questions Tony about not wanting to go to the hotel. Tony evades the question. Wendy, over the phone, shares Jack's news of securing the job and their moving to a new place. Danny, who hears the conversation, asks Tony again, but Tony refuses to answer, leaving Danny's reluctance unresolved. The scene is hopeful and excited due to the new job, but Danny's behavior hints at underlying tension.
- In this scene, Danny is examined by a doctor after fainting. The doctor checks Danny's eyes and asks about any unusual experiences, to which Danny reveals talking to his imaginary friend Tony. Wendy and the doctor discuss Danny's condition, and he is asked to rest for the day. The emotional tone is one of concern and curiosity.
- Wendy and the Doctor move to the living room where the Doctor examines Danny's medical history and suggests that his episodes are likely caused by emotional factors. Wendy shares details about Danny's injury and how it led to Jack quitting alcohol. The scene ends with the introduction of the closing day of the Overlook Hotel. The conflict in this scene arises when Wendy expresses her concerns about Danny's health and the Doctor tries to reassure her that there is nothing physically wrong with him. The conflict is resolved when the Doctor suggests that the episodes are likely caused by emotional factors and are not uncommon in children. The emotional tone of this scene is one of concern and reassurance. The visual elements in this scene include Wendy and the Doctor walking along the corridor and sitting in the living room. Wendy also lights a cigarette during the conversation.
- In this scene, Jack, Wendy, and Danny Torrance are driving through the Colorado mountains on their way to the Overlook Hotel, where Jack will be working as the caretaker for the winter. Danny expresses his hunger, and Wendy promises to find something for him to eat once they arrive at the hotel. Wendy brings up the Donner party, and Jack explains the historical event to Danny. The family eventually arrives at the hotel and meets the manager, Ullmann, who welcomes them and gives them a tour. The tone of the scene is positive and lighthearted, with some moments of apprehension as the family approaches the hotel.
- The scene commences in the Colorado Lounge of the Overlook Hotel, adorned with Native American designs. Ullman, the hotel manager, conducts a tour for the Torrance family, emphasizing the hotel's historical significance and renowned guests. Danny is spotted in the Games Room, sharing space with two unidentified girls. The Torrances are subsequently shown their apartment, and the hotel's proximity to a hedge maze is pointed out by Ullman. Although no explicit conflicts arise, there are hints at potential future strife, such as Danny's possible isolation and the hotel's immense size, which could adversely affect Jack's mental health. The tone of the scene is informative and optimistic, with Ullman proudly sharing anecdotes about the hotel's past guests, and the Torrances expressing their admiration for the hotel's beauty. The visuals consist of the Native American designs in the Colorado Lounge, Danny in the Games Room, the Grady girls, and the Torrances exploring their new apartment. The scene concludes with Ullman guiding the Torrances towards the Snowcat, stored in a garage.
- In this friendly and welcoming scene, Ullman, the hotel manager, shows Jack, Wendy, and their son Danny around the gold ballroom. Ullman explains the ballroom's capacity and mentions the removal of booze to reduce insurance. They are joined by Dick Halloran, the head chef, who shakes hands with Jack and Wendy. Ullman introduces the Torrances as the new caretakers of the hotel for the winter. The scene takes place in the hotel ballroom and corridor during the day and ends with Wendy waving at someone off-screen.
- Susie introduces Danny to the group in the ballroom before leaving. Ullman asks Halloran to show Wendy the kitchen while he continues the tour with Jack. Wendy, Danny, and Halloran proceed to the kitchen, where Halloran shows them around and makes small talk. The scene ends with Halloran showing Wendy and Danny the walk-in freezer in the kitchen.
- In this scene, Halloran shows Wendy and Danny around the kitchen of the Overlook Hotel, highlighting various meat items in the freezer and engaging in friendly conversation with Danny. He asks about Danny's favorite food and inquires about his nickname 'Doc'. Wendy, at one point, wonders how Halloran knew her son's nickname, but the matter is not pursued further. The atmosphere is warm and inviting, creating a sense of community between the characters. The scene concludes with Halloran leading the pair to the hotel's storeroom.
- In this scene, Halloran shows Wendy and Danny the hotel storeroom, pointing out various food items. He offers to get Danny some ice cream while they wait, and both Wendy and Jack give their permission for Halloran to take Danny for ice cream. The scene takes place in the storeroom of the hotel in the daytime and ends with Halloran leading Danny out of the storeroom to get ice cream. The tone is friendly and welcoming, with Halloran acting as a helpful and kind guide.
- In the Overlook Hotel's kitchen, Halloran and Danny have a heart-to-heart conversation about their 'shining' ability. Halloran shares his experiences and inquires about Danny's encounters with 'Tony'. As they converse, a hint of foreboding is introduced when Halloran warns Danny about the hotel's dangers. The scene concludes with Halloran advising Danny to avoid Room 237, followed by a time jump to a month later.
- Wendy brings breakfast to Jack in their apartment and wakes him up. They make small talk about the weather and Jack's writing, with Wendy suggesting a walk and Jack expressing his love for the hotel. The main conflict lies in Jack's struggle with his writing, which remains unresolved. The scene is warm and cozy, with visuals of Wendy taking care of Jack and Jack eating his breakfast.
- In this scene, Jack is isolated in the hotel lounge while Wendy and Danny run around and explore the hotel's maze. Wendy playfully chases Danny, allowing him to choose the direction and eventually leading them to a dead end. Meanwhile, Jack examines a model of the maze in the hotel lobby. The tone is light and playful, with no major conflicts.
- In a hotel at dusk, Wendy and Jack have a tense exchange in the lounge after she interrupts his work, while Danny explores the corridors on his tricycle. Jack, frustrated, sets a new rule for Wendy not to disturb him while working, leaving the room upset. The scene is filled with tension and frustration, showcasing the couple's strained relationship.
- Wendy and Danny play in the snow outside the hotel while Jack observes from a window. Wendy contacts the ranger's office to report phone issues and learns that many lines are down due to the storm and may not be fixed until spring. This creates a conflict as Wendy tries to resolve the issue, and there is a subtle tension due to Jack's distant observation.
- Wendy, the ranger, and Danny are the characters in this scene. Wendy tries to get help from the ranger over the radio due to the storm, but receives none. Danny encounters the ghosts of the Grady sisters and becomes scared, seeking comfort from his imaginary friend Tony. The scene takes place in the Overlook Hotel's office during the day and later moves to a hotel corridor. The conflicts in this scene include Wendy's frustration with the ranger and Danny's fear of the ghosts, which remain unresolved. The tone is tense and eerie, with significant visual elements being the stormy weather, empty hotel corridor, and ghostly appearance of the Grady sisters. The scene ends with Danny talking to Tony about being scared and the screen fading to black with the superimposition of 'Monday'.
- Wendy and Danny watch TV in the hotel lobby, where Danny requests his toy fire-engine from their room. Wendy declines, but later Jack agrees, taking the opportunity to bond with Danny. They move to Jack's apartment, having a tender conversation where Jack expresses his love and protection for Danny, creating a heartfelt moment between them.
- In this tense and emotional scene, Danny, playing with toys in the hotel corridor, approaches room 237 and calls for his mother, Wendy, who is in the boiler room. Meanwhile, Jack, in the lounge, experiences a disturbing nightmare where he kills Wendy and Danny. Wendy rushes to Jack's side, providing comfort as he shares his nightmare. The scene ends with Wendy helping Jack up from the floor, leaving Jack's internal conflict unresolved.
- Wendy helps Jack sit down in the hotel lounge due to his headache and sends Danny to his room. Wendy notices a mark on Danny's neck and becomes alarmed, accusing Jack of hurting their son. Jack denies the allegation, leading to a conflict between them. The scene ends with Wendy taking Danny and leaving Jack alone in the lounge, creating a tense and alarming atmosphere.
- Jack Torrance, a middle-aged man struggling with alcoholism, enters the ballroom of the Overlook Hotel and approaches the bar. He interacts with the bartender, Lloyd, and orders a drink despite his low cash supply and previous harm caused by alcohol. The scene is friendly and conversational, but melancholic and regretful due to Jack's internal conflict. The scene ends with Jack enjoying his drink and discussing his personal struggles.
- Wendy, upset, seeks help from Jack after finding a stranger in the hotel who tried to harm Danny, but Jack expresses disbelief and anger at her claims. The scene cuts to a montage of news reports about extreme weather conditions in other parts of the country. The conflict between Wendy and Jack remains unresolved, with Wendy insisting on the presence of the stranger and Jack dismissing her concerns. The tone of the scene is tense and confrontational.
- Jack enters room 237 and encounters a terrifying vision, while Danny, in his bedroom, is disturbed by the same presence. Meanwhile, Halloran tries to contact the hotel but fails. Back in the Torrance's apartment, Wendy is worried about Danny's bruises and confronts Jack, who lies about not finding anything in room 237. The scene is filled with tension and suspicion, as Wendy becomes more suspicious of Jack's behavior and Jack continues to deceive her. The visual elements of this scene further contribute to the sense of unease and foreboding, setting the stage for the conflicts that will arise later in the story.
- In this scene, Wendy (played by Shelley Duvall) expresses her concern to Jack (played by Jack Nicholson) about something being wrong at the Overlook Hotel. Jack becomes increasingly agitated and dismissive of her worries, leading to a heated argument. The scene takes place in Danny's bedroom, Jack's apartment bedroom, and the hotel lobby. The main conflict is Wendy's concern about the hotel and Jack's dismissal of her worries. The tone is tense and emotional. Key pieces of dialogue include Wendy's expression of her concerns and Jack's dismissive responses. Significant visual elements include the shot of the door with 'MURDER' written backwards, blood gushing from the elevators, and Wendy crying on the bed. The scene ends with Wendy crying after Jack has left the hotel.
- Jack Torrance arrives in the kitchen of the Overlook Hotel and creates a mess. Meanwhile, Head Chef Halloran tries to contact the hotel but finds the phone lines down due to a storm. He requests the Forest Service to call after twenty minutes. Jack interacts with the hotel staff, while Halloran communicates with the ranger. The scene is tense and foreboding, with Jack's behavior and Halloran's concern for the family's safety. The scene ends with Jack and Grady entering the Gentlemen's Toilet.
- Jack Torrance, the caretaker of the Overlook Hotel, encounters Delbert Grady in the men's toilet and holds the door open for him. Grady sponges Jack with a wet serviette, and Jack recognizes him as the caretaker who murdered his family and committed suicide. However, Grady denies it and warns Jack about his son trying to bring an outside party into the situation, revealing it's a 'nigger cook'. Jack is confused and suspicious, causing tension between them. The scene takes place in the men's toilet of the Overlook Hotel and has a tense and eerie tone.
- In the men's restroom, Jack converses with Grady about Danny's talent and Wendy's interference. Simultaneously, Wendy decides to escape with Danny using the Snowcat if Jack refuses to leave. Danny, asleep in his bedroom, repeats 'Red Rum' and is unable to wake up due to Tony's influence. The scene is filled with tension, ominous undertones, and a growing sense of danger.
- Jack arrives at the hotel office and attempts to contact someone on the radio, but receives no response. He disassembles the radio set in frustration. Meanwhile, Halloran speaks to the ranger about the Overlook Hotel situation, but faces difficulties in communication. The scene ends with Halloran boarding a plane to Denver, still uncertain about the hotel's status.
- The scene opens in a hotel lounge where Jack is typing, followed by a cut to an airport during the day. The main focus then shifts to Durkin's garage, where Durkin receives a call from Halloran, who is at Stapleton Airport. Halloran urgently needs to reach the Overlook due to problems with the caretakers and requests a snowcat. Durkin agrees to arrange it, ending their call on a note of resolution.
- In this tense and ominous scene, Durkin finishes a phone call as a snowstorm worsens outside. Halloran drives through the storm, while Danny and Wendy watch TV in the Overlook Hotel. Wendy, concerned, leaves Danny to check on Jack, who obsessively types pages of repetitive text. Wendy discovers this writing, which reads 'All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy,' and becomes increasingly fearful. She screams as Jack enters the room, holding a baseball bat defensively, leaving the conflict unresolved and the tension high.
- In this scene, Jack and Wendy have a tense conversation about what to do with Danny, which takes place in various locations of the hotel. Jack becomes increasingly aggressive and accusatory, eventually revealing his intent to harm Wendy. The scene ends with Wendy hitting Jack on the head with a bat and him falling down the stairs.
- In the kitchen of the Overlook Hotel, Wendy finds Jack unconscious and drags his body to the food storage room, opening the door with a pin. After he regains consciousness and questions her, she leaves him there and closes the door. This tense and suspenseful scene highlights the main conflict of Wendy protecting herself and Danny from Jack's increasing violence, with the resolution of Wendy locking him in the storage room. The key pieces of dialogue include Jack's repeated 'What are you doing?' and Wendy's lack of response, with visual elements of Wendy dragging Jack's body and his eventual regaining of consciousness.
- Wendy (being scared of Jack) prepares to let Jack out of the food storage room, but instead backs away, gets a knife, and weeps out of fear. Jack tries to manipulate Wendy into opening the door by faking concern for his injury. However, Wendy decides to prioritize getting help for her son Danny instead. The scene takes place in the kitchen and food storage room of the hotel, and it ends with Wendy leaving Jack locked up and going to get help for Danny. The tone is tense and emotional, and the key visual elements include Wendy holding a knife and Jack's injured ankle.
- In this tense and ominous scene, Jack asks Wendy to check the Snowcat and radio, hinting that he has sabotaged them. Wendy finds the damaged distributor cap, realizing Jack's intentions. Jack falls asleep in the food storage room, and Grady, a hotel employee, wakes him up, discussing the situation. Jack reassures Grady that he will handle it. The scene takes place in various locations of the Overlook Hotel, with Wendy trying to escape and get help, while Jack and Grady prevent her and support Jack's harsh actions.
- In this tense and suspenseful scene, Halloran drives a snowcat through a snow-covered road at night, while Danny, possessed by Tony, writes the word 'MURDER' in reverse on the door of his apartment using lipstick and holds a knife. Wendy wakes up and shrieks upon seeing the word 'MURDER' on the door, and Jack starts to chop down the door with an axe. The main conflict is Jack trying to break down the door to get to Wendy and Danny, while they are trying to hide from him. The scene ends with Jack breaking down the door and Wendy and Danny hiding in the bathroom, with the door bolted and locked.
- In this tense and suspenseful scene, Wendy helps Danny escape through a bathroom window into the snow while Jack threatens to break down the bathroom door. The conflict between Wendy and Jack intensifies as Jack swings an axe at the door, causing Wendy to scream off-screen. The key pieces of dialogue include Jack's taunts and Wendy's instructions to Danny to hide. The visual elements significant to this scene include Wendy pushing Danny out of the window, Jack moving through his apartment with an axe, and Wendy struggling to keep the bathroom door closed with a knife. The scene ends with Jack swinging the axe at the door, heightening the sense of danger and leaving the conflict unresolved.
- In the Overlook Hotel, Wendy (Wendy Torrance) hides in the bathroom as Jack (Jack Nicholson) tries to break in, wielding an axe and shouting for her to open the door. She wounds his hand, causing him to retreat. Meanwhile, Halloran (Scatman Crothers) approaches the hotel and Danny (Danny Lloyd) hides in an oven. Wendy slashes at the door with a knife and Halloran enters, only to be attacked and killed by Jack. The scene ends with Jack calling out for Danny, increasing the sense of danger and tension.
- Wendy, the mother, finds Jack, the father, in a dog costume, poised to harm Danny, their son, who is hiding behind Halloran's snowcat. Jack chases Danny through the hotel and into the maze, while Wendy turns off the power in the hotel. Halloran remains outside in his snowcat, uninvolved. The scene is filled with tension, suspense, and a growing sense of danger and urgency as Wendy tries to protect Danny from Jack's violent intentions.
- In this tense and suspenseful scene, Danny runs through the maze to escape his father, Jack, who is pursuing him. Wendy, carrying a knife, searches for Danny in the hotel and discovers the dead body of Halloran and an injured guest in the lobby. As Jack gets closer to Danny in the maze, Wendy finds skeletons in the hotel lounge. The scene ends with Wendy seeing blood gushing out of the elevator, indicating that something terrible has happened.
- In this tense and suspenseful scene, Danny and Jack are outside the hotel in the snowy maze. Danny, who is hiding behind the maze, leaves footprints in the snow that end abruptly. Jack, holding an axe and calling out for Danny, also leaves footprints as he moves around the maze. The scene ends with Jack approaching an opening in the maze, leaving the viewer in suspense about the outcome of their separation.
- In this tense and emotional scene, Wendy, armed with a knife, finds Danny after he falls in the snow near the maze entrance and takes him to the snowcat in a frantic effort to escape. Meanwhile, a wounded and delirious Jack, armed with an axe, staggers along the maze, calling out for Danny. The conflict between Wendy and Jack reaches a tragic end as Jack is left dead in the snow, and the scene closes with a dissolve to a photograph of guests at a ball in the hotel in 1921.
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Character Jack Torrance
Description Jack's transition from a caring father and husband to a violent and deranged individual feels abrupt. The screenplay could benefit from showing a gradual descent into madness, with subtle hints and foreshadowing to make his transformation more believable.
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Character Wendy Torrance
Description Wendy initially seems resourceful and concerned for her family's safety but later appears passive and indecisive. The screenplay could explore her internal conflict and motivations more deeply to justify her actions, especially her decision to stay with Jack despite his abusive behavior.
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Description The nature of the supernatural forces in the Overlook Hotel is unclear. The screenplay presents a mix of ghosts, premonitions, and psychological horror without a consistent explanation. Establishing clearer rules for the supernatural elements would enhance the narrative coherence.
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Element Scenes of Danny riding his tricycle through the hotel corridors
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Element Jack's descent into madness
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Suggestion While Jack's gradual breakdown is essential to the story, some of the scenes depicting his anger and frustration could be streamlined or merged to avoid repetition.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Jack | Jack starts off as an optimistic and excited man eager for a fresh start at the hotel, but as he delves deeper into its dark history, he becomes increasingly agitated and dismissive. Influenced by the supernatural forces at play, he descends into madness, becoming manipulative, aggressive, and ultimately violent. His obsession with power and control leads to his downfall, culminating in a menacing and unpredictable figure consumed by inner demons. | The character arc for Jack is well-developed and effectively showcases his descent into madness. However, there could be more clarity in depicting the triggers that lead to his transformation, as well as a stronger emphasis on the internal struggles he faces throughout the story. Additionally, the transition from his initial optimism to his final violent state could be more gradual and nuanced to enhance the believability of his character development. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more subtle hints of Jack's inner turmoil and vulnerabilities early on in the screenplay. This will help foreshadow his eventual descent into madness and make his transformation more impactful. Additionally, explore the relationship dynamics between Jack, Wendy, and Danny to further highlight the emotional stakes at play and deepen the audience's investment in Jack's journey. |
Ullman | At the beginning of the film, Ullman is introduced as a strict and serious manager who is focused on the hotel's reputation and history. As the story progresses, he begins to show a more compassionate side, especially towards the Torrance family as they face the supernatural forces within the hotel. Ullman ultimately plays a crucial role in helping the family navigate the dangers of the hotel and comes to their aid in a time of need, showcasing his growth from a distant authority figure to a supportive ally. | The character arc for Ullman is well-developed, showing a progression from a strict manager to a more compassionate and supportive figure. However, there could be more depth added to his character by exploring his personal motivations and backstory. This would help to make his transformation more impactful and provide a deeper understanding of his actions throughout the film. | To improve the character arc for Ullman, consider incorporating scenes that delve into his past experiences at the hotel and how they have shaped his beliefs and actions. This could add complexity to his character and provide a more nuanced portrayal of his evolution from a distant authority figure to a supportive ally. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other staff members or guests could further enhance his character development and add layers to his interactions with the Torrance family. |
Danny | Danny starts off as a curious and anxious child, hesitant about the move to the hotel and relying on his imaginary friend Tony for comfort. As the story progresses, he discovers his psychic abilities and the malevolent forces at play in the hotel. Despite his fear, Danny shows bravery and resourcefulness in protecting himself and his mother from danger. By the end of the film, Danny has embraced his powers and uses them to outsmart his father and survive the terrifying ordeal in the maze. | The character arc for Danny is well-developed, showcasing his growth from a vulnerable child to a brave and resilient hero. However, there could be more emphasis on Danny's emotional journey and internal struggles as he comes to terms with his powers and the dangers surrounding him. Additionally, more exploration of Danny's relationship with his father and the impact of their dynamic on his development could add depth to the character arc. | To improve the character arc for Danny, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into his emotional turmoil and the internal conflict he faces as he grapples with his powers and the supernatural forces at play. Show more interactions between Danny and his father to highlight the complexity of their relationship and how it shapes Danny's growth throughout the story. Additionally, explore the consequences of Danny's actions and decisions on himself and those around him to create a more impactful and resonant character arc. |
Wendy | Wendy's character arc in the screenplay begins with her as a hopeful and optimistic mother, trying to reassure her son about the move to the hotel. As the story progresses, she faces increasing challenges and dangers, which push her to her limits. Wendy's arc culminates in a moment of courage and determination, where she must confront her fears and protect her son from the imminent threat posed by her husband and the supernatural elements in the hotel. | The character arc for Wendy is well-developed, showcasing her evolution from a nurturing mother to a resilient protector. However, there could be more emphasis on Wendy's internal struggles and emotional growth throughout the story. Providing more insight into her thoughts and feelings could add depth to her character and make her arc even more compelling. | To improve Wendy's character arc, consider incorporating more internal monologues or moments of reflection where she grapples with her fears and doubts. This could help the audience connect with Wendy on a deeper level and understand the emotional journey she undergoes. Additionally, exploring Wendy's backstory and motivations further could enhance her character development and make her arc more impactful. |
Halloran | Halloran starts off as a friendly and knowledgeable chef at the hotel, who later reveals his psychic abilities and deep understanding of the supernatural occurrences. As the story progresses, he becomes a caretaker and protector, taking on a sense of responsibility and urgency to ensure the safety of the family. Ultimately, he sacrifices himself to save them from the dangers of the hotel, showcasing his determination and selflessness. | The character arc for Halloran is well-developed and engaging, showcasing his evolution from a friendly chef to a heroic figure. However, there could be more emphasis on his psychic abilities and how they impact his actions and decisions throughout the story. Additionally, his relationship with the Torrance family could be further explored to deepen the emotional impact of his sacrifice. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that highlight Halloran's psychic abilities and how they shape his interactions with the other characters. Develop his relationship with the Torrance family by showing more moments of connection and bonding, which will make his sacrifice more impactful. Additionally, explore his internal struggles and conflicts to add depth to his character and make his journey more compelling. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||
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Isolation and Confinement | The screenplay frequently emphasizes the isolated location of the Overlook Hotel, its vast and labyrinthine structure, and the harsh weather conditions that cut off the family from the outside world. This is seen in the constant mentions of the hotel's isolation, the tour of the hotel, the snowstorm, and the maze. | The theme of isolation and confinement explores the psychological impact of being trapped in a limited space, the fear of the unknown, and the consequences of feeling cut off from the world. In this screenplay, the theme is used to heighten the tension and suspense, as well as to reflect the characters' emotional states. | ||
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Family Dynamics and Relationships | The screenplay explores the relationships between Jack, Wendy, and Danny, revealing their vulnerabilities, fears, and love for each other. This is evident in the conversations between Jack and Wendy, Wendy and Danny, and Jack and Danny, as well as in their interactions with other characters like Ullman, Halloran, and the hotel itself. | The theme of family dynamics and relationships highlights the importance of trust, communication, and support within a family. In this screenplay, the theme is used to create emotional depth, as well as to contrast with the growing horror and isolation experienced by the characters. | ||
Supernatural and the Occult | The screenplay features supernatural elements, such as Danny's 'shining' ability, the ghosts of the Grady sisters, and the hotel's dark history. This is seen in the conversations between Danny and Halloran, the encounters with the ghosts, and the hotel's eerie atmosphere. | The theme of the supernatural and the occult is used to create a sense of mystery and unease, as well as to heighten the horror and suspense. By incorporating these elements, the screenplay challenges the characters' perceptions of reality and tests their ability to cope with the unknown. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to secure a job opportunity and find connection and belonging in their new environment. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to navigate the challenges of the hotel, ensure their family's safety, and uncover the mysteries of the supernatural occurrences. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict is between the protagonist's desires for stability, security, and success, and the challenges presented by the unknown, supernatural forces, and personal demons. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's goals and conflicts contribute to their growth, as they confront personal demons, navigate supernatural occurrences, and strive for stability and security.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative forward, creating tension and suspense as the protagonist faces internal and external challenges in the isolated hotel setting.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts deepen the themes of isolation, power, control, and the supernatural, exploring the human psyche and the struggle for survival in the face of unknown and uncontrollable forces.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Job Interview at the Overlook Hotel | Suspenseful, Formal, Professional | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Danny's Reluctance to Move to the Overlook Hotel | Concerned, Hopeful, Playful | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | |
3 - Job Offer and Hotel History | Suspenseful, Foreboding, Informative, Casual | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Danny's Reluctance and Jack's New Job | Anxious, Reassuring, Excited | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Danny's Fainting Incident and Imaginary Friend | Suspenseful, Disturbing, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Doctor Examines Danny's Medical History | Tense, Concerned, Reflective | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
7 - The Torrance Family's Arrival at the Overlook Hotel | Tense, Foreboding, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - The Torrances' Guided Tour of the Overlook Hotel: A Glimpse into History and Foreshadowing of Future Events | Mysterious, Intriguing, Historical, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Welcoming the New Caretakers: A Tour of the Gold Ballroom | Suspenseful, Informative, Friendly | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Welcome Tour of the Hotel Kitchen | Tense, Mysterious, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Exploring the Hotel Kitchen: A Playful Interlude | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Halloran Offers to Get Danny Ice Cream | Suspenseful, Informative, Friendly | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | |
13 - Halloran and Danny Discover Their Shining Connection | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Foreboding | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Breakfast in Bed at the Overlook Hotel | Tension, Mystery, Introspective, Nostalgic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
15 - Exploration and Play in the Hotel Maze | Tense, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Interrupted Work and Frustration in The Shining's Hotel | Tense, Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Phone Issues Arise as the Storm Rages On | Tense, Suspenseful, Playful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Stormy Day at the Overlook Hotel: Wendy's Frustration and Danny's Fear | Suspenseful, Eerie, Tense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Jack and Danny's Heartfelt Connection | Tender, Inquisitive, Protective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 2 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Jack's Disturbing Nightmare and Danny's Search for Wendy | Tense, Disturbing, Anxious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - Wendy's Discovery | Tense, Emotional, Accusatory | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
22 - Jack's Struggle: A Night at the Overlook Hotel Bar | Tense, Emotional, Intense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
23 - Wendy's Distress and Jack's Disbelief | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Deception and Suspicion at the Overlook | Suspenseful, Tense, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Wendy's Concerns Met with Dismissal and Anger | Tense, Emotional, Angry | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Jack's Destructive Behavior and Halloran's Concern | Tense, Mysterious, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Jack's Suspicions Arise in Encounter with Grady | Tense, Suspenseful, Disturbing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Escalating Tensions: Jack and Grady's Discussion, Wendy's Escape Plan, and Danny's Disturbing Sleep | Tense, Suspenseful, Disturbing, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
29 - Communication Breakdown | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Arranging a Snowcat: Preparing for an Urgent Journey | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
31 - Unraveling Sanity: Jack's Obsession and Wendy's Fear | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
32 - Escalating Tensions: Jack's Aggression and Wendy's Fear | Tense, Menacing, Confrontational, Disturbing | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Wendy's Escape: Locking Away the Violence | Tense, Aggressive, Disturbing | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Wendy's Fear and Manipulation | Tense, Aggressive, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
35 - Jack Sabotages the Snowcat and Seeks Grady's Support | Menacing, Tense, Sinister | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
36 - The Snowcat Ride and the Breakdown of Door 237 | Tense, Menacing, Suspenseful, Disturbing | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
37 - Wendy and Danny's Escape Thwarted by Jack's Axe-Wielding Rage | Tense, Aggressive, Terrifying, Suspenseful | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Wendy's Defiance and Halloran's Fate | Tense, Aggressive, Terrifying, Suspenseful | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - The Pursuit in the Overlook Hotel | Tense, Suspenseful, Terrifying | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - Pursuit in the Maze and Discoveries in the Hotel | Tense, Suspenseful, Terrifying, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
41 - The Search in the Snowy Maze | Tense, Suspenseful, Terrifying | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Escape from the Overlook: A Desperate Search and a Tragic End | Tense, Suspenseful, Terrifying, Desperate | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Building tension
- Intense atmosphere
- Effective use of setting
- Strong character dynamics
- High emotional impact
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development
- Low external conflict
- Limited emotional impact
- Some dialogue may feel repetitive or expository
- Some scenes may be too intense for sensitive viewers
Suggestions
- Focus on developing the characters further to increase emotional impact and engagement.
- Consider adding more external conflict to the story to keep the plot moving forward and increase tension.
- Work on trimming down and refining dialogue to avoid repetition and overly expository lines.
- Be mindful of the intensity level of certain scenes and consider the potential impact on some viewers.
- Experiment with different ways of conveying information and events more subtly to avoid redundancy and ensure clarity.
- Physical environment: The screenplay takes place in various locations, primarily in the Overlook Hotel, a secluded and scenic location in Colorado. The hotel is set against a backdrop of mountains and a lake, providing a serene and picturesque landscape. Other settings include an apartment in Boulder, a garage, and a Miami apartment. The physical environment is often depicted as isolated, contributing to a sense of unease and foreboding. The natural beauty of the setting contrasts with the dark events that unfold, heightening the tension and suspense.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay include the hotel's rich history of hosting presidents, movie stars, and royalty, as well as its Native American designs based on Navajo and Apache motifs. The cultural aspect of family dynamics is also present, with conversations revolving around job opportunities and potential moves. The cultural elements add a layer of sophistication and prestige to the setting, while also highlighting the contrast between the glamorous past and the dark present.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is hierarchical, with clear distinctions between the hotel staff and guests. The societal structure is also evident in the interactions between the characters, reflecting common concerns and aspirations. The hotel's isolation contributes to a sense of confinement and unease, with the characters' actions often influenced by their desire to maintain order and control.
- Technology: The technological elements in the screenplay are minimal, with the focus on the characters' interactions and the physical environment. The few technological aspects present include a radio communication system, a portable TV set, and a snowcat, which highlight the limited communication options and harsh conditions of the hotel's remote location.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by contributing to a sense of isolation, unease, and confinement. The characters' actions are often influenced by their desire to maintain order and control, with the hotel's hierarchical societal structure and remote location adding to the tension and suspense.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay by providing a serene and picturesque landscape that contrasts with the dark events that unfold. The hotel's rich history and Native American designs add a layer of sophistication and prestige, while the minimal technological elements highlight the limited communication options and harsh conditions of the hotel's remote location.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by highlighting the contrast between the glamorous past and the dark present, as well as the characters' struggle to maintain order and control in a confined and isolated environment. The hotel's hierarchical societal structure and remote location add to the tension and suspense, while the natural beauty of the setting provides a stark contrast to the dark events that unfold.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice in the screenplay is characterized by a blend of natural dialogue, detailed descriptions, and a sense of realism. The writer effectively captures the essence of the characters and their interactions, creating a palpable and immersive atmosphere throughout the narrative. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by establishing a strong sense of authenticity and relatability in the characters and their experiences. The detailed descriptions and realistic dialogue provide a vivid and immersive experience for the reader, drawing them into the world of the story and enhancing the emotional impact of the narrative. |
Best Representation Scene | 1 - Job Interview at the Overlook Hotel |
Best Scene Explanation | Scene 1 best showcases the author's unique voice through its concise and realistic dialogue, detailed scene descriptions, and smooth transitions between locations. The scene effectively introduces the main characters and establishes the professional and polite atmosphere of the hotel interview, setting the tone for the rest of the screenplay. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Relationship between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade | There is a strong positive correlation between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade in this screenplay. Scenes with higher Emotional Impact tend to receive higher Overall Grades, indicating that emotional depth plays a significant role in the quality of the scene. |
Impact of Tone on Dialogue | Scenes with a more suspenseful or tense tone tend to have higher quality dialogue. This suggests that the tone of the scene influences the quality of the dialogue, with more intense tones leading to more engaging and impactful dialogue. |
Character Changes and Emotional Impact | There is a positive correlation between Character Changes and Emotional Impact in this screenplay. Scenes where characters undergo significant changes tend to have a higher emotional impact on the audience, indicating that character development plays a key role in evoking emotions. |
Conflict and High Stakes | Scenes with higher levels of Conflict also tend to have higher stakes. This suggests that the intensity of the conflict in a scene is directly related to the importance and consequences of the outcome, creating a sense of urgency and tension. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases a strong ability to build tension and suspense, with effective character dynamics and engaging dialogue. There is room for improvement in pacing and consistency, as well as deepening the emotional complexity of the characters.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Screenplay | Read 'The Silence of the Lambs' by Ted Tally and 'Jaws' by Peter Benchley. These screenplays excel in pacing, suspense, and character development. | Studying these screenplays will help improve pacing, character development, and consistency in your writing. |
Exercise | Practice writing a scene with a 30-second time limit. Focus on conveying the essential elements of the story and characters while maintaining tension.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will help improve pacing and the ability to convey essential information efficiently. |
Writing Group | Join a writing group or find a writing partner to provide feedback on your work. | Receiving feedback from others can help identify areas for improvement and provide new perspectives on character development and emotional depth. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Hero's Journey | The protagonist, Jack Torrance, embarks on a journey of self-discovery and redemption, facing various trials and tribulations along the way. | The Hero's Journey is a common narrative structure in literature and film, where the protagonist undergoes a transformation through a series of challenges. Examples include Star Wars, The Lion King, and The Lord of the Rings. |
Haunted Hotel | The Overlook Hotel is a central location in the story, and its haunted nature plays a significant role in the plot. | Haunted hotels are a common trope in horror films, such as The Shining, The Haunting, and 1408. |
Isolation | The Overlook Hotel's isolation during the winter months is a key factor in the story, heightening the tension and fear. | Isolation is a common trope in horror films, as it amplifies the characters' vulnerability and helplessness. Examples include The Thing, The Shining, and The Martian. |
Imaginary Friend | Danny's imaginary friend, Tony, is a significant character in the story, providing insight into Danny's thoughts and feelings. | Imaginary friends are a common trope in literature and film, often serving as a source of comfort or guidance for the child character. Examples include The Sixth Sense, Drop Dead Fred, and The Lovely Bones. |
Madness | Jack's descent into madness is a central theme in the story, driving the plot and increasing the tension. | Madness is a common trope in horror films, often used to explore the darker aspects of human nature. Examples include Psycho, The Shining, and Misery. |
Monster Dad | Jack's transformation into a violent and abusive father is a key plot point in the story. | Monster Dad is a common trope in horror films, often used to explore the darker aspects of family dynamics. Examples include The Shining, The Texas Chainsaw Massacre, and The Amityville Horror. |
Past Trauma | The past trauma of the Overlook Hotel's previous caretaker plays a significant role in the story, influencing Jack's actions and decisions. | Past trauma is a common trope in literature and film, often used to explore the long-term effects of traumatic experiences. Examples include The Shining, A Beautiful Mind, and The Pianist. |
Psychic Powers | Danny's psychic powers, or 'shining', are a key element in the story, allowing him to perceive things beyond his normal senses. | Psychic powers are a common trope in science fiction and fantasy, often used to explore the limits of human potential. Examples include X-Men, Stranger Things, and The Matrix. |
Redemption | The story explores the theme of redemption, as Jack struggles to overcome his past mistakes and regain his family's trust. | Redemption is a common trope in literature and film, often used to explore the human capacity for forgiveness and growth. Examples include A Christmas Carol, The Shawshank Redemption, and The Pursuit of Happyness. |
Trapped | The characters are trapped in the Overlook Hotel during the winter months, increasing the tension and fear. | Trapped is a common trope in horror films, often used to heighten the characters' vulnerability and helplessness. Examples include The Shining, The Descent, and 127 Hours. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Some Loglines to consider:
A family man descends into madness while serving as the winter caretaker of an isolated and haunted hotel. |
A young boy with psychic abilities confronts the dark secrets of a malevolent hotel. |
Isolation and a sinister supernatural force drive a writer to terrorize his wife and son. |
A chilling exploration of the human psyche and the destructive power of addiction. |
In the face of a blizzard and a haunted hotel, a mother fights to protect her son from his own father. |
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Explanation: The Shining screenplay is a chilling and atmospheric horror story with strong performances and effective use of suspense. However, it suffers from pacing issues and underdeveloped characters, particularly Wendy. Further exploration of the supernatural elements and the hotel's backstory could enhance the narrative.