Narcos

Executive Summary

Logline: A gritty narrative exploring the rise of Pablo Escobar as the kingpin of the Medellín cartel and the DEA's relentless pursuit to bring him down. See other logline suggestoins

Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend

GPT4: Recommend

Recommend

Explanation: Narcos is a compelling, gritty exploration of the global drug trade, focusing on the rise of Pablo Escobar and the DEA's efforts to combat drug trafficking. With strong character development, particularly of Escobar, and a narrative that skillfully blends action with historical detail, the screenplay offers a deep dive into the complexities of the drug war. While it could benefit from tighter pacing and more developed secondary characters, its strengths in storytelling and character arcs make it a standout script.

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Overview

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller, Historical

Setting: 1989-1993, Colombia, Miami, Peru

Overview: The screenplay boasts a strong overall score of 8.1, reflecting its compelling characters, engaging plot, and effective exploration of complex themes. The strengths lie in character development, dialogue, and unpredictability, while areas for improvement include pacing, character changes, and emotional depth.

Themes: Good vs. Evil, The Power of Corruption, The Importance of Determination, The Devastating Consequences of Violence, The Impact of Childhood Trauma, The Search for Redemption, The Complexity of Family

Conflict and Stakes: The main conflict in the story is between the DEA and the Colombian drug cartels. The DEA is trying to stop the flow of cocaine into the United States, while the drug cartels are trying to protect their profits. The stakes are high, as the drug trade is a multi-billion dollar industry and the cartels are willing to use violence to protect their interests.

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Market Analysis

Budget Estimate:$50-70 million

Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-54 who are interested in crime dramas, thrillers, and stories about the drug trade.

Marketability: The screenplay has a strong premise, a talented cast, and a timely subject matter. It is also a well-written and suspenseful thriller that is sure to keep audiences engaged.

The screenplay has a strong premise, great characters...

The screenplay has a great plot, intense action sequences...

Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations.

Scene Level Percentiles

The screenplay excels in concept, emotional impact, and unpredictability but could benefit from enhanced plot development, character depth, and originality. The writer demonstrates a balanced writing style with both intuitive and conceptual elements.

Script Level Percentiles

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Characters: 8.3 See More
Premise: 8.5 See More
Structure: 7.9 See More
Theme: 7.8 See More
Visual Impact: 8.0 See More
Emotional Impact: 7.5 See More
Conflict: 7.5 See More
Originality: 8.1 See More

Emotions Elicited Percentiles

Robert McKee: "The audience doesn’t go to the movies to see plot; they go to feel emotion, to be moved."
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.

Key Strengths

The screenplay excels in its concept rating, placing in the top 7% of analyzed screenplays. This indicates a strong foundation and a potentially compelling story premise.
The screenplay demonstrates a high level of unpredictability, ranking in the top 6% of analyzed screenplays. This suggests that the story takes unexpected turns and keeps the audience engaged.
The screenplay has a strong emotional impact, ranking in the top 32% of analyzed screenplay. This indicates that the story effectively evokes emotions and resonates with the audience.

Areas for Improvement

The screenplay's plot rating is in the lower third, indicating weaker plot development. Focus on crafting a more engaging and well-structured plot.
Character development and dialogue could be strengthened. Consider exploring character motivations and relationships in more depth to create more memorable and relatable characters.
The screenplay's originality score, while above average, could be further enhanced. Strive to introduce unique and fresh elements to set your story apart.

Writer Style

The percentile patterns suggest a balance between intuitive and conceptual writing styles. High rankings in concept and emotional impact indicate conceptual strengths, while average rankings in dialogue and character development suggest some intuitive elements as well.

Balancing Elements

Consider increasing the focus on plot development while maintaining the strong emotional impact and unpredictability.
Explore ways to enhance character development and dialogue without sacrificing the screenplay's strengths in concept and emotional impact.

Intuition Level

integrated

Overall Assessment

The screenplay shows promise with its strong concept, emotional impact, and unpredictability. By addressing areas for improvement in plot, character development, and originality, the writer can further refine the screenplay and harness its full potential.

How this was done: Each criteria is ranked in comparison to scripts in our Vault (such as The Matrix, Breaking Bad, etc.) This allows you to see where you stand compared to other produced scripts for each criteria.

How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library

Note: The ratings are the averages of all the scenes.

Title	Grade	Percentile	Before	After
Scene Unpredictability	7.93	91	Dr. Horrible's Sing-Along Blog: 7.92	Terminator 2: 7.93
Scene Concept	8.4	84	The King's speech: 8.3	fight Club: 8.4
Scene Story Forward	8.6	84	Narcos Pilot: 8.5	the 5th element: 8.6
Scene Pacing	8.50	82	Gladiator: 8.49	Rambo: 8.50
Scene Engagement	9.00	81	The Addams Family: 8.99	fight Club: 9.00
Scene High Stakes	8.3	77	Conclave: 8.2	Vice: 8.3
Scene External Goal	7.54	75	Mr Robot: 7.53	Narcos: 7.54
Scene Originality	8.86	75	Her: 8.85	Blade Runner: 8.86
Script Characters	8.30	74	Legally Blonde: 8.20	the black list (TV): 8.30
Scene Conflict Level	8.1	73	Ex-Machina: 8.0	fight Club: 8.1
Script Visual Impact	8.00	71	Emilia Perez : 7.90	the black list (TV): 8.00
Script Premise	8.50	71	Die Hard: 8.40	Erin Brokovich: 8.50
Script Originality	8.10	62	A Complete Unknown: 8.00	Titanic: 8.10
Scene Formatting	8.18	55	Nickel Boys : 8.17	Inglorious Basterds: 8.18
Script Structure	8.14	55	American Fiction: 8.13	the pursuit of happyness: 8.14
Script Structure	7.90	54	Dune Part Two: 7.80	Black mirror 304: 7.90
Script Conflict	7.50	53	The King's speech: 7.40	Casablanca: 7.50
Scene Overall	8.4	51	Triangle of sadness: 8.3	Knives Out: 8.4
Overall Script	8.10	51	Dr. Jekyll and Mr Hyde : 8.06	the pursuit of happyness: 8.10
Scene Plot	7.8	34	The Greatest Showman: 7.7	Erin Brokovich: 7.8
Script Emotional Impact	7.50	27	Sherlock Holmes: 7.40	the pursuit of happyness: 7.50
Scene Dialogue	7.5	26	The Umbrella Academy: 7.4	Titanic: 7.5
Scene Characters	8.1	26	Memento: 8.0	the pursuit of happyness: 8.1
Scene Character Changes	6.4	23	Ted: 6.3	the 5th element: 6.4
Script Theme	7.80	21	2001: 7.70	the 5th element: 7.80
Scene Internal Goal	8.00	20	KILLING ZOE: 7.98	fight Club: 8.00
Scene Emotional Impact	7.2	19	Ted: 7.1	the 5th element: 7.2

Writer's Voice

Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its gritty, fast-paced dialogue, and intense visual descriptions. The narrative is driven by the author's unique perspective on the drug war, exploring its high stakes, moral complexities, and the personal sacrifices of those involved in the fight against it.

Best representation: Scene 1 - Takedown at La Dispensaria. Scene 1 effectively showcases the author's unique voice through its blend of action, dialogue, and gritty atmosphere. The fast-paced narrative and vivid descriptions create a sense of urgency and danger, establishing the high stakes and moral complexities of the drug trade.

Memorable Lines:

Pablo Escobar: Gentlemen, let me tell you who I am. I am Pablo Fucking Escobar. My eyes are everywhere. You can't do a goddamn thing in Antioquia without me knowing about it. I'm going to be President of Colombia one day. (Scene 5)
Connie: The baby died in my hands. (Scene 11)
Nancy Reagan: So to my young friends out there, life can be great. But not when you can't see it. So open your eyes to life, to see it in the vivid colors that God gave us as a precious gift to His children. Say yes to your life. And when it comes to drugs and alcohol, just say no. (Scene 13)
Pablo: We'll take five. (Scene 8)
Murphy: Now we owned him. And he didn't even know it. (Scene 1)

Writing Style:

The screenplay exhibits a blend of gritty realism, moral ambiguity, and complex character dynamics. It explores societal issues and the darker side of human nature through nuanced storytelling and character-driven narratives. The writing is often intense and suspenseful, with a focus on high-stakes situations and compelling dialogue.

Style Similarities:

David Simon
Vince Gilligan

Other Similarities: The screenplay also draws inspiration from other writers, including Steven Zaillian and Quentin Tarantino, in specific scenes. However, the overall writing style remains cohesive and consistent, anchored by the dominant styles of David Simon and Vince Gilligan.

Story Shape

Emotions Elicited

Suspense

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Fear

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Joy

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Screenplay Rating:

Recommend

Executive Summary

Narcos is a compelling, gritty exploration of the global drug trade, focusing on the rise of Pablo Escobar and the DEA's efforts to combat drug trafficking. With strong character development, particularly of Escobar, and a narrative that skillfully blends action with historical detail, the screenplay offers a deep dive into the complexities of the drug war. While it could benefit from tighter pacing and more developed secondary characters, its strengths in storytelling and character arcs make it a standout script.

Strengths

The screenplay effectively captures the gritty and complex nature of the drug trade, providing a deep dive into the lives of both the traffickers and law enforcement. high
Strong opening and closing scenes that bookend the narrative compellingly, setting the tone and wrapping up with a strong climax. high ( Scene 1 Scene 14 )
Excellent character development, particularly with Pablo Escobar, showing his transformation and increasing ruthlessness. high ( Scene 12 )
The screenplay uses action effectively to drive the plot forward, particularly in scenes involving shootouts and tense exchanges. medium ( Scene 11 )
Dialogue is sharp and authentic, enhancing the realism of the screenplay and deepening character development. medium

Areas of Improvement

Some scenes could benefit from tighter pacing to maintain momentum and keep the audience engaged throughout. medium
Certain secondary characters lack depth and could be more fully developed to enhance their impact on the story. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 6 )
The narrative could include more distinct and varied settings to enhance visual interest and give a broader scope of the drug trade's impact. low
Some technical descriptions of drug manufacturing and smuggling operations are overly complex and could be simplified for clarity. low ( Scene 8 Scene 9 )
The emotional impact on victims of the drug trade could be further explored to deepen the narrative's emotional resonance. medium

MissingElements

The screenplay could benefit from a stronger female presence, adding more depth to the roles of women in this male-dominated story. medium
There is a lack of exploration of the socio-political context of Colombia which could provide a richer backdrop for the story. medium
The impact of the drug trade on local communities is underrepresented and could add another layer of complexity to the story. medium

NotablePoints

The screenplay does an excellent job of weaving historical facts with narrative fiction, creating a compelling story that feels both educational and entertaining. high
The use of archival footage and real events gives the screenplay a documentary feel that adds to its authenticity. high ( Scene 2 Scene 3 )

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Screenplay Insights:

Characters: 8.3, The screenplay demonstrates a strong foundation in character development, crafting well-rounded and relatable characters that drive the narrative forward. However, there are opportunities to enhance the depth and complexity of certain characters, as well as refine their arcs to create a more emotionally engaging experience for the audience. See More

Premise: 8.5, The screenplay's premise is compelling and clear, establishing a captivating drug war narrative with morally complex characters. The conflict between the DEA and the Colombian cartels, particularly Pablo Escobar, sets the stage for an engaging story. However, the premise could benefit from further exploration of the internal struggles and motivations of the characters, particularly Murphy and Escobar, to deepen audience engagement and thematic resonance. See More

Structure: 7.9, The screenplay "Narcos: Season 1" exhibits a strong structure and plot development, providing a clear and engaging narrative. The pacing is well-balanced, creating tension and release, and the plot's progression aligns effectively with the intended themes and character arcs. However, there are a few areas where refinements could enhance the screenplay's storytelling dynamics. See More

Theme: 7.8, The screenplay effectively explores themes of corruption, the impact of violence, and the moral dilemmas faced by those involved in the drug war. However, the themes could be further refined to deepen their emotional impact and resonance with the audience. See More

Visual Impact: 8.0, The screenplay presents a vivid and gritty portrayal of the narco-trafficking world, utilizing strong visuals and immersive descriptions to transport readers into the dangerous and thrilling atmosphere of the story. It effectively captures the power struggles, violence, and moral dilemmas that characterize this realm, offering a compelling visual narrative that complements the screenplay's themes and characters. See More

Emotional Impact: 7.5, The screenplay effectively utilizes a range of storytelling techniques to elicit emotional responses, but it could benefit from further development of emotional arcs and character motivations to enhance its overall impact on the audience. See More

Conflict: 7.5, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes in the fast-paced, high-stakes world of the Colombian drug trade. It captures the tension between the relentless DEA agents and the ruthless drug cartels, highlighting the personal and moral challenges faced by all involved. However, it could benefit from further development of stakes and motivations, as well as a more satisfying resolution. Nevertheless, the screenplay lays a foundation for a compelling narrative with its strong characters, complex themes, and exploration of the war on drugs. See More

Originality: 8.1, The screenplay demonstrates originality in its portrayal of the drug trade and the complexities of the characters involved. The narrative provides unique perspectives on morality, duty, and the consequences of violent actions, setting it apart from other crime dramas. See More

Summary The screenplay follows DEA agents as they track down and combat the powerful drug cartels in Colombia, led by the ruthless drug lord Pablo Escobar. The agents work tirelessly to gather intelligence, conduct raids, and negotiate deals in the dangerous world of drug trafficking. Along the way, they face challenges, betrayals, and violent encounters, highlighting the complexities and dangers of the drug war. The story is filled with suspenseful moments, intense action sequences, and emotional reflections on the impact of the drug trade. Ultimately, the agents' dedication and bravery are put to the test as they strive to bring down the cartels and make a difference in the war on drugs.

Screenplay Story Analysis

Story Critique The screenplay has a compelling premise and a strong focus on the real-life events surrounding the drug war in Colombia. The story provides a unique perspective on the DEA's efforts to combat drug trafficking and the rise of Pablo Escobar as a powerful drug kingpin. However, the plot lacks a clear and cohesive narrative structure, resulting in a fragmented and disjointed feel. The pacing is inconsistent, with some scenes dragging on while others feel rushed. Additionally, the character development could be more nuanced and fleshed out, providing a deeper understanding of their motivations and actions.

Suggestions:

Tighten the plot structure by identifying a central conflict or goal and developing a clear narrative arc with a beginning, middle, and end.
Improve the pacing by trimming unnecessary scenes and streamlining the flow of the story.
Expand on the character development by exploring the motivations, backstories, and inner conflicts of the main characters.

Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here

Beginning The beginning of the screenplay effectively establishes the setting and introduces the key characters. The aerial footage of the Andes Mountains and the voiceover narration provide a strong sense of the geographic and historical context. The scene where DEA agents intercept Poison's phone call creates an intriguing hook and sets up the main conflict. However, the subsequent scenes involving the shootout at La Dispensaria and the DEA's internal discussions feel disjointed and could benefit from a more cohesive flow.

Suggestions:

Smooth the transition between the opening scenes and the shootout at La Dispensaria by providing more context or establishing a clearer connection between the events.
Tighten the DEA's internal discussions by focusing on the most essential information and clarifying their decision-making process.

Middle The middle part of the screenplay introduces Pablo Escobar as a powerful and ruthless drug lord. The montage of historical footage and voiceover narration effectively explores the complexity of the drug trade and the moral ambiguity surrounding it. The scenes depicting Escobar's negotiations and interactions with other characters showcase his cunning and manipulative nature. However, the pacing in this section feels somewhat uneven, with certain scenes dragging on while others rush through important developments.

Suggestions:

Streamline the pacing by trimming unnecessary dialogue or subplots and focusing on the most impactful moments.
Consider adding more depth to Escobar's character by exploring his motivations and vulnerabilities.

Ending The ending of the screenplay lacks a strong resolution and feels somewhat abrupt. The confrontation between Murphy and La Quica is anticlimactic, and the subsequent scenes involving Escobar's death and Murphy's reflections on the drug war feel rushed and underdeveloped. The screenplay would benefit from a more satisfying conclusion that provides a sense of closure and leaves a lasting impact on the audience.

Suggestions:

Expand on the confrontation between Murphy and La Quica to create a more intense and dramatic climax.
Develop a more nuanced and reflective ending that explores the long-term consequences of the drug war and Murphy's personal journey.

CharacterInconsistencies

Character Cockroach
Description Cockroach's character arc exhibits inconsistencies. Initially portrayed as cunning and opportunistic, his decision to betray Pablo appears abrupt and driven by plot necessity rather than organic character development. His motivations for feeling entitled to a larger share lack sufficient groundwork, making his betrayal less believable.
( Scene 8 Scene 10 Scene 12 )
Character DAS Agents
Description The DAS agents initially present as incorruptible and resistant to Pablo's bribes. However, their sudden susceptibility to his offers in later sequences seems convenient for the plot rather than a natural progression of their characters.
( Scene 5 Scene 12 )

StoryInconsistencies

Description The timeline surrounding the Lion's smuggling operation is unclear. The sequence suggests multiple flights occurred before Pablo established dedicated cocaine labs, but the narrative later implies the labs were already in operation during this period.
( Scene 9 )

PlotHoles

Description The explanation for the intercepted cocaine shipment lacks clarity. While Cockroach's betrayal is revealed, the specifics of how the DAS agents knew the contents and location of the shipment are not adequately addressed.
( Scene 12 )

DialogueAuthenticity

Description The casual and informal language used by the surveillance operators, particularly the line 'This fuckwad just told us where he's going,' seems out of place given the professional and high-stakes nature of their work.
( Scene 1 (INT. BEECHCRAFT - NIGHT) )

Redundancies

Element Scene: Confrontation with authorities
( Scene 5 Scene 12 )
Suggestion The two scenes where Pablo confronts authorities at checkpoints share similar structures and dialogue. While they effectively establish his power and influence, consolidating them into one impactful scene could streamline the narrative.

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Murphy - Score: 80/100

Role

Protagonist

Personality

MBTI: ISTJ
Enneagram: Type 1: The Reformer

Scenes

Strongest: #1

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

DEA agent rooted in duty and responsibility.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

Struggles with moral dilemmas and emotional trauma.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 8/10

Evolution reflecting moral conflicts amid a violent landscape.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Distinctive voice reflecting resilience and duty.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Decisions influenced by duty and emotional stakes.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Complex interactions with allies and family reveal vulnerabilities.

Scene Impact 8/10

Murphy drives tension and emotional stakes within key scenes.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

Murphy embodies the classic hero archetype with moral complexities.

Thematic Plot Integration 9/10

Murphy’s journey encapsulates the larger themes of duty and consequence.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Elicits strong emotional engagement through personal struggle.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Steve Murphy is a dedicated DEA agent stationed in Colombia during the height of the drug war in the late 1980s. With a strong sense of duty, he is driven by the desire to fight against the narcotics trade that inundates both Colombia and the United States. His background reflects a working-class upbringing in West Virginia, cultivating values of hard work, loyalty, and a personal responsibility to protect his family and country from the drug threat. Murphy's initial characterization presents him as someone who navigates personal and professional tensions, caught between his responsibilities as an agent and his role as a husband.

Values And Beliefs: Justice, Protecting his family, Responsibility

Strengths And Skills: Expert surveillance skills, Resilience, Strong moral compass

Suggestions

Further explore his internal conflicts between personal and professional lives.
Provide additional backstory to understand his motivations more deeply.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy's upbringing affect his choice to join the DEA?
What specific beliefs does he struggle with as he navigates the drug war?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Murphy carries emotional wounds related to the violence and chaos surrounding him in Colombia. His internal conflict is exacerbated by the strain on his marriage, as well as the constant danger of his job affecting not just him but also his family. The character exhibits moments of vulnerability, particularly when faced with the consequences of drug violence, which suggests a deep-seated fear of failure and loss. He grapples with the morality of his actions, questioning whether he is ultimately a hero or a tool of a flawed system.

Character Wound: Fear of failing to protect loved ones

Character Flaws: Guilt, Overzealousness, Tendency to prioritize duty over family

Suggestions

Introduce more scenes depicting his vulnerability and emotional struggles.
Highlight consequences of his decisions on personal relationships.

Follow-up Questions

What specific incidents trigger Murphy's moments of guilt?
How do his flaws impact his relationships with colleagues and family?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 8

Over the course of the screenplay, Murphy begins with a clear sense of right and wrong in his fight against drug traffickers, but he faces profound moral complexities as the violence escalates and innocent lives are lost. His character arc involves reconciling his sense of duty with the brutal reality of the drug war, leading to moments of doubt and introspection about the effectiveness of his actions. While he desires to protect his family and maintain order, the immense pressure and ethical dilemmas challenge his views on justice, leading him to question the morality of his own actions.

Polarity Changes: Starts committed to law enforcement, but experiences moral ambiguities.

Transformation Triggers: Exposure to violence, loss of colleagues, and personal relationships impacted by his work.

Suggestions

Focus on pivotal moments that challenge Murphy’s moral compass.
Create deeper interactions showing his change over time.

Follow-up Questions

What specific events cause shifts in Murphy's moral beliefs?
How do his experiences in Colombia shape his perception of justice?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Murphy’s speech patterns convey authority as a DEA agent, often adopting a professional and serious tone. His use of voiceover allows insight into his internal thoughts, revealing his reflections on the drug war's impact on his life and the lives of others. His dialogue includes elements of dry humor occasionally, providing a contrast to the weight of the situations he faces. Overall, his voice serves as a narrative tool to express his feelings of frustration, determination, and self-doubt.

Unique Voice: Murphy's dialogue showcases a blend of professionalism and personal struggle, often with a serious undertone.

Suggestions

Incorporate more personal anecdotes in his dialogue to humanize him.
Develop psychological tension through his voiceover, hinting at his internal conflicts.

Follow-up Questions

How do Murphy’s speech patterns differentiate him from other characters?
What moments in dialogue could deepen audience connection to his character?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Murphy's choices throughout the screenplay highlight his commitment to his duties as a DEA agent, yet they are often complicated by the emotional stakes involved. His willingness to put himself in danger demonstrates his bravery, but that same bravery leads him to make decisions that further intertwine his personal life with the chaotic world he's fighting against. Moreover, conflicts arise between his duties and the implications they have for his family life, as seen in his struggles with guilt and the impact of violence on those he loves.

Motivations: To eliminate drug trafficking and protect his family.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires to save lives and bring justice but needs to reconcile his role in the violence.

Suggestions

Highlight moments where he chooses duty at the expense of personal relationships.
Show consequences of his actions on both the mission and his family.

Follow-up Questions

What drives Murphy to make the choices he does?
How does he justify morally ambiguous decisions to himself?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

Murphy's relationships underscore his emotional struggle. His bond with his wife Connie showcases the strain his job places on their marriage, leading to memorable moments of tension and tenderness that reveal his vulnerability. Additionally, interactions with fellow agents and informants reflect both camaraderie and conflict, illustrating the blurred lines between personal and professional relationships in a high-stakes environment. These relationships offer insight into Murphy’s character, providing a broader understanding of his motivations and the sacrifices he makes.

Suggestions

Create scenes that emphasize the tension between Murphy and Connie.
Explore his relationships with colleagues to develop themes of loyalty and betrayal.

Follow-up Questions

How do his relationships with others change throughout the story?
What pivotal moments in his interactions with Connie and colleagues define his character?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

Murphy's presence is instrumental in shaping the tone and direction of key scenes throughout the screenplay. His actions often introduce conflict, as his decisions drive the narrative forward and reveal the harsh realities of the drug war. In scenes where Murphy faces the consequences of his choices, the emotional weight is palpable, enhancing the stakes for both himself and those around him. Overall, Murphy serves as a crucial audience surrogate, allowing viewers to engage with the complex world of the drug trade.

Suggestions

Increase the emotional stakes in scenes by highlighting his reactions.
Utilize Murphy’s perspective to deepen audience engagement during conflicts.

Follow-up Questions

What specific scenes showcase Murphy's impact most effectively?
How could his reactions heighten the emotional resonance of critical moments?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

As the protagonist, Murphy fulfills the role of the classic hero who is fighting against incredible odds. His journey reflects not only personal stakes but also a broader commentary on the struggle against drug trafficking and its societal impact. His actions emphasize themes of justice, morality, and sacrifice. However, Murphy's complexity arises from the moral ambiguities of his choices, as he occasionally blurs the lines of legality and ethics in pursuit of his goals, which shapes the narrative in a unique way.

Symbolic Role: Symbol of law enforcement's struggle against drug trafficking.

Suggestions

Create scenarios where Murphy's moral dilemmas challenge his heroic stance.
Emphasize the consequences of his actions to reflect moral ambiguity.

Follow-up Questions

What events help solidify Murphy's role as the hero?
How does he embody or challenge traditional hero archetypes throughout the screenplay?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 9

Murphy's character arc serves as a lens through which the screenplay’s central themes of duty, morality, and the personal cost of war are explored. His internal struggles and external pressures reflect the chaos surrounding the drug trade and the corrupting influence of power. Murphy’s growth—or lack thereof—offers profound commentary on the effectiveness of law enforcement in the face of systemic violence, thus reinforcing the screenplay's overarching narrative and thematic concerns.

Suggestions

Highlight parallels between Murphy's personal struggles and broader societal issues.
Enhance thematic depth by showcasing conflicts within Murphy related to justice.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy's personal journey reflect the societal impacts of drug trafficking?
What thematic elements can be strengthened through his character development?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Murphy effectively elicits emotional responses from the audience, particularly feelings of sympathy and frustration as he grapples with the harsh realities of drug enforcement. His moments of doubt, guilt, and vulnerability allow viewers to engage with his character more intimately. The audience's emotional connection grows as Murphy navigates his complicated world, creating a layered portrayal that reflects both personal and collective struggles against drug violence.

Emotional Impact: Frustration and empathy for his struggles.

Suggestions

Increase focus on the impact of Murphy's decisions on innocent lives.
Explore deeper emotional moments in his interactions to amplify connection.

Follow-up Questions

What events resonate most emotionally with the audience?
How can his character's journey be portrayed to enhance empathy?

Personality Types

MBTI: istj

Murphy's behavior reflects introverted qualities, valuing responsibility and duty while displaying a strong adherence to rules and traditions. He approaches challenges systematically, underlining a sense of reliability.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: estj (70%)

Suggestions

Utilize Murphy's organizational skills in problem-solving scenarios.
Explore interactions that highlight both introverted and extroverted traits.

Follow-up Questions

How might an ISTJ or ESTJ understanding influence Murphy's interactions?
What situations can emphasize both sides of his personality?

Enneagram: type 1: the reformer

Murphy embodies the principles of a Type 1 through his dedication to justice and morals, striving for integrity and ethical behavior in a corrupt environment.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: type 6: the loyalist (60%)

Suggestions

Illustrate Murphy's strong sense of duty in decision-making scenes.
Show conflicts arising from his desire for rightness and loyalty.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy's Enneagram type manifest in leadership situations?
What dilemmas could reveal his struggle between reforming and loyalty?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (1)

Murphy balancing the chaos at home while receiving critical intel about drug trafficking.

Why: This scene emphasizes the duality of Murphy's life, showcasing his resilience and commitment both as a DEA agent and a father.

Weakest Scene (0)

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Why: none

Suggestions:

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Pablo - Score: 78/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ENTJ
Enneagram: Type 8 - The Challenger

Scenes

Strongest: #7

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 9/10

Ambitious drug lord with a thirst for power.

Complexity And Depth 8/10

Conflicted drug lord with an emotional wound.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 6/10

Pablo's journey reflects a gradual descent into isolation and paranoia as his power grows.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Pablo's speech is authoritative and persuasive, reflecting his power.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Pablo's choices are driven by greed and a desire to maintain control.

Relationship Dynamics 7/10

Pablo's relationships are characterized by loyalty and manipulation.

Scene Impact 8/10

Pablo's presence often escalates tension in scenes.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

As the primary antagonist, Pablo embodies the chaos of the drug trade.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Pablo's journey parallels themes of power and morality.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Engages viewers with a mix of fear and curiosity.

Foundational Definition

Score: 9

Pablo Escobar is shaped by his rise to power in the drug trade, driven by an ambition to dominate and control the cocaine market. His wealth affords him influence and power, transforming him from a petty criminal into one of the most notorious drug lords. His belief in his own invincibility and his drive for notoriety are fundamental to his identity.

Values And Beliefs: Wealth equates to power., Loyalty to family and friends is paramount., Fear and violence are necessary tools for control.

Strengths And Skills: Charismatic leadership, Strategic thinking, Ability to bribe and manipulate law enforcement

Suggestions

Explore more of his early life and what drove him into crime.
Show nuanced interactions that reveal his inner doubts or vulnerabilities.

Follow-up Questions

What personal experiences might have shaped Pablo's ruthless worldview?
How do his early successes impact his later decisions?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 8

Beneath his ruthless exterior, Pablo is revealed to have internal conflicts regarding loyalty and morality. He struggles with the consequences of his actions on innocent lives yet often justifies them as necessary for his empire. His emotional wound stems from early experiences of poverty and striving for acceptance and respect.

Character Wound: Desire for acceptance stemming from a poor background.

Character Flaws: Hubris, Impulsivity in violent reactions, Paranoia about betrayal

Suggestions

Deepen his internal struggles with moments of reflection.
Contrast his public persona with private doubts in key scenes.

Follow-up Questions

What moments trigger his paranoia about betrayal?
How does he cope with the human cost of his pursuit of power?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 6

Throughout the screenplay, Pablo's initial rise appears confident and calculated. However, the constant threat from rivals and authorities leads to a more paranoid and violent stance over time. While he embodies the archetype of the powerful drug lord, his increasing fear of losing that power silently molds his character.

Polarity Changes: Escobar experiences both peaks of immense power and valleys as his empire begins to crumble.

Transformation Triggers: Arrests of key associates and increasing pressure from law enforcement.

Suggestions

Highlight significant turning points in his power struggles.
Illustrate moments of personal loss that lead to deeper paranoia.

Follow-up Questions

At what point does power begin to feel like a burden for Pablo?
How does he justify his actions as the stakes grow higher?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Pablo’s dialogues are marked by a confident and assertive tone, displaying both his control in negotiations and his ability to intimidate others. His choice of words often reveals his duality as a charismatic figure who can also be deeply threatening.

Unique Voice: Employs a commanding tone, often with a mix of charm and menace.

Suggestions

Incorporate more interpersonal dialogue that humanizes him.
Introduce moments where his dialogue conveys vulnerability or doubt.

Follow-up Questions

What language does he use to manipulate or control his allies?
How does Pablo's manner of speaking change under pressure?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Pablo's behavior throughout the screenplay often reflects his motivations to assert dominance through ruthless methods. His quick decisions to resort to violence when threatened underline his belief that strength is paramount in maintaining power.

Motivations: To expand his drug empire and eliminate threats to his power.

Desires Vs Needs: Wants absolute power but needs to address his isolation and fear of betrayal.

Suggestions

Show more of his decision-making process in quieter moments.
Add moments where his decisions lead to unintended consequences.

Follow-up Questions

What actions does Pablo take when he feels cornered?
How does he rationalize his violent behavior?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 7

Pablo’s connections with characters like Cockroach and his family reveal a side of him that values loyalty deeply. Yet, he is also willing to betray allies if they pose a threat. These dynamics showcase his complexity—a loving husband and father who is also a dangerous criminal.

Suggestions

Deepen interactions with key relationships to show his emotional range.
Contrast his loyalty to family with his betrayal of allies.

Follow-up Questions

How do familial ties influence Pablo's decisions?
What drives him to betray someone he once trusted?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

Pablo's interactions often lead to critical turning points, introducing conflict and tension. His charisma can disarm others, creating suspense around what he will demand next, while his volatility creates an atmosphere of danger in every scene he occupies.

Suggestions

Enhance scenes by focusing on his reactions to setbacks.
Use physical presence and body language to amplify his impact.

Follow-up Questions

How do other characters react to Pablo's presence?
What are the stakes in scenes where he's involved?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

Pablo's role as the antagonist drives the narrative's conflict forward. His actions set the stage for law enforcement's response and illustrate the broader implications of the drug trade's impact on society. He is both a symbol of the corruption stemming from power and a cautionary figure for the costs associated with it.

Symbolic Role: Represents ambition, danger, and the moral compromises of pursuing power.

Suggestions

Further emphasize the consequences of his actions on innocent lives.
Investigate the power dynamics between him and law enforcement.

Follow-up Questions

How does his villainy compare to other antagonists in the series?
What does his role say about leadership in corrupt systems?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Pablo’s rise and fall represents the moral decay and consequences of unchecked power and ambition. His pursuit of wealth is juxtaposed against the violent impacts it has on society, adding depth to the commentary on the drug trade.

Suggestions

Highlight moments where his actions intersect with societal themes.
Explore his ideology through the context of other characters' journeys.

Follow-up Questions

How do his actions reflect the broader themes of the storyline?
What societal commentary does his character provide?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Pablo’s character evokes a mix of fear and fascination. His complex persona engages viewers, creating a compelling emotional dynamic that keeps audiences invested in his fate and the consequences of his actions.

Emotional Impact: Elicits tension and curiosity about his ruthless tactics.

Suggestions

Create more scenes that show his vulnerability or humanity.
Encourage moments of introspection to enhance audience connection.

Follow-up Questions

What moments evoke the strongest emotional reaction towards him?
How do his relationships enhance the tension in viewer response?

Personality Types

MBTI: entj

Pablo's commanding presence, strategic mindset, and focus on leadership reflect ENTJ characteristics.

Confidence: 80%

Suggestions

Utilize ENTJ traits to further shape his decision-making scenes.
Explore contrasting interactions with more introverted characters.

Follow-up Questions

How might his ENTJ traits clash with more consensus-driven characters?
What situations showcase his leadership style?

Enneagram: type 8 - the challenger

Pablo exhibits strong Type 8 traits through his assertiveness, desire for control, and fear of being controlled.

Confidence: 85%

Suggestions

Focus on his motivations rooted in security and control.
Delve into moments where his sense of challenge leads to conflict.

Follow-up Questions

How does his Enneagram type affect his interactions with rivals?
In what ways does vulnerability challenge his Type 8 persona?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (7)

Pablo's negotiation scene with DAS agents showcases his commanding presence and manipulation abilities.

Why: This scene encapsulates his power dynamics and illustrates his skill in turning situations in his favor.

Weakest Scene (0)

none

Why: none

Suggestions:

Highlight internal motivations more effectively.
Include more interpersonal dynamics to enhance engagement.

Gustavo - Score: 70/100

Role

Supporting character

Personality

MBTI: ENTJ
Enneagram: 3

Scenes

Strongest: #5
Weakest: #7

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Intelligent and resourceful narco-trafficker.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

Loyal yet pragmatic; potential internal conflicts.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 6/10

Potential for growth amidst chaos.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Pragmatic and strategic tone.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Pragmatic choices reflecting his priorities.

Relationship Dynamics 7/10

Complex ties with Pablo and others.

Scene Impact 7/10

Critical moments amplify tension.

Role Fulfillment 7/10

Loyal henchman with strategic insight.

Thematic Plot Integration 7/10

Embodies the tensions of loyalty and profit.

Emotional Resonance 6/10

Evokes tension; moments of vulnerability add relatability.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Gustavo, known as Gustavo Gaviria, emerges as a key figure in the narco-trafficking landscape of Colombia, particularly aligned with Pablo Escobar. His foundational traits are defined by his intelligence, resourcefulness, and strategic thinking, making him an integral part of the cocaine business. His upbringing and connections within the drug trade endow him with a pragmatic worldview, seeing opportunities for profit in an otherwise chaotic environment.

Values And Beliefs: Profit maximization, Loyalty to close allies, Importance of strategic partnerships

Strengths And Skills: Strategic planning, Negotiation, Adaptability

Suggestions

Deepen his backstory to provide context for his decisions and alliances.
Show more of his interactions with Pablo to highlight their mutual dependence and differing philosophies.

Follow-up Questions

What motivates Gustavo's loyalty to Pablo? Is it purely financial?
How does Gustavo view the increasing violence associated with their drug operations?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Gustavo exhibits a complex personality shaped by loyalty and pragmatism, but may carry a fear of instability in an unpredictable world of narco-trafficking. Internal conflicts could arise from realizing the potential consequences of their drug empire on society and his personal life.

Character Wound: Fear of betrayal in a treacherous environment.

Character Flaws: Overconfidence, Tendency to overlook ethical implications

Suggestions

Introduce moments of doubt or ethical dilemmas that challenge his loyalty to Pablo.
Explore his relationships with other characters to showcase the depth of his loyalties and fears.

Follow-up Questions

Does Gustavo ever question the morality of the drug trade?
How does he cope with the violent consequences of their business?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 6

Gustavo's journey might reflect a slow evolution from a strictly profit-driven approach to a more cautious stance as the repercussions of their actions become clearer. Key events, such as betrayals or particularly violent outcomes, could prompt him to reconsider his position.

Polarity Changes: Dynamics shift with success and danger in the drug business.

Transformation Triggers: Increased violence and competition in the drug trade.

Suggestions

Highlight key turning points where Gustavo must choose between loyalty and self-preservation.
Create scenarios that force him to confront the consequences of their actions.

Follow-up Questions

What events lead Gustavo to reconsider his role in the drug trade?
Are there specific betrayals that influence his perspective?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Gustavo's dialogue often reveals his strategic mindset and ability to negotiate. He speaks with confidence and authority but can also exhibit moments of vulnerability that hint at his deeper fears and motivations.

Unique Voice: Direct, with a focus on negotiating terms and strategy.

Suggestions

Ensure his dialogue encapsulates his pragmatic worldview while allowing for emotional moments.
Add layers to his speech that reflect both confidence and apprehension.

Follow-up Questions

How do his speaking patterns change when discussing business versus personal matters?
Are there specific phrases that he uses repeatedly to emphasize his beliefs?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Gustavo's decisions are driven by a mix of opportunism and loyalty. He is willing to take calculated risks for financial gain but is also attentive to the loyalty he owes to his allies and partners. This duality can create tension in critical moments that test his values.

Motivations: Financial gain and loyalty to Pablo.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires wealth and power but needs security and stability.

Suggestions

Create scenarios where bad choices lead to severe consequences to highlight his pragmatic nature.
Show moments of hesitation that illustrate the weight of his decisions.

Follow-up Questions

What moral lines is Gustavo willing to cross for success?
How does he react when his choices lead to unintended consequences?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 7

Gustavo's major relationship with Pablo Escobar defines much of his behavior. Their bond is marked by loyalty yet is strained by the demands of their operations and the violent world they inhabit. His relationships with other characters, including rivals and allies, further shape his strategic mindset.

Suggestions

Explore his relationships with rival factions to enhance the tension in his decision-making.
Show moments of camaraderie with Pablo that strengthen their partnership.

Follow-up Questions

How does he perceive Pablo's leadership style?
Are there fractures in his relationship with Pablo that indicate a potential turning point?

Scene Impact

Score: 7

Gustavo’s presence often introduces strategic calculations that elevate the stakes in pivotal scenes. His decisions can create tension among characters, influencing outcomes that revolve around negotiation or conflict.

Suggestions

Maximize his influence in scenes by ensuring he plays a vital role in key decisions.
Incorporate scenes where his absence creates a void, allowing tension to build.

Follow-up Questions

What specific scenes highlight his strategic importance?
How do other characters respond to his presence or decisions?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 7

Gustavo serves primarily as a supporting role that complements Pablo Escobar's character. While not the primary antagonist or protagonist, his insights and actions are vital to the unfolding dynamic of the drug war, showcasing the intricate power structure within the narrative.

Symbolic Role: Represents the loyalty and intelligence within the drug trade.

Suggestions

Consider moments where he acts contrary to expectation to challenge typical drug lord tropes.
Ensure his role as a strategist is clearly depicted throughout the narrative.

Follow-up Questions

How does Gustavo influence the larger power dynamics within the story?
Are there instances of him taking action that defies his expected role?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 7

Gustavo’s character arc intertwines with the themes of loyalty, morality, and the pursuit of wealth within a dangerous world. His decisions reflect the broader complexities faced by characters involved in illegal activities and highlight the moral challenges they encounter.

Suggestions

Tighten connections between his personal journey and the overarching themes of the screenplay.
Broaden his involvement in scenes that highlight the moral complexities of the drug trade.

Follow-up Questions

What specific themes are emphasized through Gustavo's decisions?
How do his choices reflect the moral ambiguities of their actions?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 6

Gustavo evokes various emotions from the audience through his strategic choices and complex relationship with Pablo. His moments of vulnerability can cultivate empathy, particularly when faced with moral dilemmas, making him a relatable character amid the chaos.

Emotional Impact: Creates tension and conflict throughout the story.

Suggestions

Highlight emotional beats that reveal his internal conflicts.
Add depth to his interactions with other characters to elicit audience sympathy.

Follow-up Questions

What emotions do his scenes typically convey?
Are there specific moments where he elicits empathy from the audience?

Personality Types

MBTI: entj

His strategic thinking and leadership qualities align with the ENTJ type, as he is a decisive leader who thrives in challenging environments.

Confidence: 80%

Suggestions

Leverage his ENTJ traits in dialogue to reflect confidence and authority.
Explore how his leadership skills affect group dynamics.

Follow-up Questions

How does his leadership style compare to Pablo's?
Are there moments when his ENTJ traits create conflict?

Enneagram: 3

The competitive and success-oriented aspects of his personality suggest an Enneagram Type 3, driven by the desire for achievement and validation.

Confidence: 75%

Suggestions

Utilize his Enneagram traits to deepen character conflict.
Explore his motivations as they relate to success and fear of failure.

Follow-up Questions

How does his quest for success affect his relationships?
Are there failures that challenge his identity?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (5)

His strong presence and strategic input at the cocktail party emphasizes his influence.

Why: Gustavo's ability to navigate complex relationships is clearly highlighted, establishing him as a key player in the narco world.

Weakest Scene (7)

His presence is less impactful when he is less involved in the action of the drug trade.

Why: This diminishes his role as a key strategist, making him feel secondary.

Suggestions:

Rework this scene to give him a more active role or unique perspective.
Ensure his strategic insights are presented even when he is not directly involved in the action.

Steve - Score: 80/100

Role

Protagonist

Personality

MBTI: ISFJ
Enneagram: Type 1 - The Reformer

Scenes

Strongest: #1
Weakest: #2

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Dedicated DEA agent with a strong moral compass.

Complexity And Depth 7/10

Struggles with guilt and moral dilemmas in law enforcement.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 7/10

Murphy evolves as he witnesses the brutal realities of narco-trafficking.

Dialogue And Voice 8/10

Murphy's dialogue is characterized by a straightforward and earnest tone.

Behavior And Choices 9/10

Murphy's decisions reflect a commitment to enforcing the law while grappling with its repercussions.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Murphy’s most significant relationship is with his wife, Connie, highlighting personal stakes in his professional life.

Scene Impact 8/10

Murphy's presence often introduces moral complexity, conflict, and urgency.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

Murphy serves as the central protagonist navigating the treacherous landscape of narco-trafficking.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

Murphy’s personal journey aligns closely with themes of morality, justice, and sacrifice.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Engages the audience through personal stakes and moral conflicts.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

Steve Murphy is a dedicated DEA agent working in Colombia during a pivotal moment in the drug-trafficking era. His background as a West Virginia farmboy instills in him values of hard work, morality, and a strong sense of duty. These traits shape his worldview as he seeks to combat the rising influence of narco-trafficking and protect the innocent. His commitment to his family and profession highlights his dual struggle between personal life and the chaos surrounding him.

Values And Beliefs: Law enforcement, family commitment, justice, duty.

Strengths And Skills: Dedication, intelligence, ability to gather intelligence, adaptability in chaotic situations.

Suggestions

Deepen his backstory to highlight how his upbringing influences his current motivations.
Explore more of his internal conflicts regarding the morality of his actions as a DEA agent.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy's West Virginia upbringing affect his decisions in Colombia?
What are his views on the moral complexities of battling narco-trafficking?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 7

Despite his strong moral foundation, Murphy grapples with the emotional toll of his job, feeling guilt over collateral damage that occurs during operations. His internal conflict between lawfulness and the violent reality of drug enforcement creates depth in his character, leading to moments of doubt and questioning his role in the larger narrative of the drug war.

Character Wound: Guilt over innocent lives affected by the drug war.

Character Flaws: Possible overzealousness, struggles with emotional detachment.

Suggestions

Introduce scenes that show his vulnerability during tense moments.
Include conversations with characters that challenge his moral beliefs.

Follow-up Questions

What specific events lead to Murphy feeling guilty about the DEA's actions?
How do his internal conflicts affect his relationship with his wife?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 7

Throughout the screenplay, Murphy's journey represents a gradual awakening to the complexities of the drug war. Triggered by witnessing the consequences of his actions, he confronts his moral alignment in a profession that often blurs the lines between good and bad. This exploration may lead him toward either a firm stance on his values or a path of greater internal conflict as the war escalates.

Polarity Changes: Increased tension between duty and personal morality as he witnesses violence.

Transformation Triggers: Witnessing collateral damage and personal loss, particularly in relation to the lives his operations affect.

Suggestions

Clarify pivotal moments that reshape Murphy's perspective on his role.
Show interactions with key characters that drive his decision-making.

Follow-up Questions

What key moments in the drug war challenge Murphy's beliefs?
Will Murphy emerge as a more steadfast character or one increasingly conflicted?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 8

His speech patterns emphasize clarity and a sense of urgency. As an agent, he uses language that conveys professionalism while also revealing his emotional stakes. His voice-over commentary provides insight into his character's internal struggles and perspectives about the chaotic world he navigates.

Unique Voice: Direct and sincere, often reflecting the gravity of his situation.

Suggestions

Add more personal anecdotes in his dialogue to deepen his character.
Make his exchanges with others reveal more about his emotional state.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy’s dialogue change in emotional moments compared to professional interactions?
What does his use of language say about his view of the drug war?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 9

Murphy's choices throughout the screenplay serve to illustrate his dedication to his role as a DEA agent. However, as the narrative unfolds, moments of doubt and ethical dilemmas emerge, compelling him to reassess the consequences of his actions both personally and professionally. His decisions not only affect his career but also impact his relationships with colleagues and family.

Motivations: To dismantle drug trafficking operations and protect innocent lives.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires to bring justice clashes with the need for moral clarity and emotional peace.

Suggestions

Examine his decision-making process in greater detail during critical scenes.
Highlight how external pressures shape his choices in contrast to his internal values.

Follow-up Questions

What moments lead Murphy to question the legality of his orders?
How do his choices affect his relationships with family and colleagues?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

His relationship with Connie reflects both the strain and support found in their marriage due to Murphy's dangerous profession. Their interactions show love and concern but also tension, as Connie faces the realities of Murphy's work and its impact on their family. This dynamic adds emotional weight to Murphy’s journey, rooting his struggles in personal stakes.

Suggestions

Develop more intimate moments between Murphy and Connie to explore emotional undercurrents.
Incorporate conversations with colleagues that reflect his interpersonal conflicts.

Follow-up Questions

How does Connie’s perspective on Murphy’s work influence his choices?
What moments reveal the emotional strain on their marriage due to his job?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

Throughout the screenplay, Murphy's actions and decisions create tension both in terms of narrative and emotional stakes. Whether giving orders to take down a target or witnessing the fallout of raids, he drives the plot while serving as a moral lens through which the audience can view the chaos of the drug war.

Suggestions

Enhance scenes where Murphy faces moral dilemmas to heighten tension.
Showcase his impact in moments of resolution to emphasize his role.

Follow-up Questions

How do individual scenes shift emotionally or thematically based on Murphy's involvement?
What specific moments demonstrate his influence on the narrative?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

In his role as a DEA agent, Murphy symbolizes the struggle for justice against overwhelming odds. As he encounters the horrific realities of the drug trade, he grapples with his identity and purpose, making him a relatable figure in an otherwise chaotic narrative. His growth and internal conflicts reflect the broader themes of good, evil, and moral ambiguity within the story.

Symbolic Role: Embodies the conflict between law enforcement and the chaotic realities of drug trafficking.

Suggestions

Reinforce Murphy's symbolic role through interactions with significant thematic elements.
Contrast his journey with opposing characters to enhance thematic tension.

Follow-up Questions

How effectively does Murphy’s character drive the narrative forward?
What moments distinctly illustrate his role within the overarching themes of morality?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

Murphy’s experiences emphasize the screenplay's exploration of morality in law enforcement, highlighting the costs of the drug war on both individuals and society. His internal struggles resonate with the broader theme of personal sacrifice amid the chaos, emphasizing how one's decisions reflect a continuous battle between right and wrong in a morally complex world.

Suggestions

Deepen connections between Murphy and the story's central themes.
Illustrate consequences of his choices more vividly to enhance thematic impact.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy’s character reflect the screenplay's major themes?
What moments showcase the ethical dilemmas inherent in his journey?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Murphy's character evokes strong emotional reactions from the audience by illustrating the human cost of policing the narcotics trade. His struggles and conflicts mirror the audience's own feelings about justice and morality, making his journey profoundly relatable and engaging.

Emotional Impact: Engenders sympathy and tension through personal stakes and moral dilemmas.

Suggestions

Highlight key emotional moments to deepen audience connection.
Create scenes that juxtapose Murphy's inner turmoil with external conflicts.

Follow-up Questions

What specific scenes elicit strong emotions regarding Murphy’s character?
How does the audience's perception of Murphy shift throughout the screenplay?

Personality Types

MBTI: isfj

Murphy exhibits traits associated with ISFJs, such as being dutiful, responsible, and deeply committed to his relationships and service.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: infj (75%)

Suggestions

Use the ISFJ profile to explore how Murphy's values influence his decisions.
Consider incorporating more nuanced emotional depth based on the INFJ type.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy’s ISFJ tendency toward duty shape his responses to challenges?
Do any INFJ traits resonate with Murphy’s internal conflicts?

Enneagram: type 1 - the reformer

Murphy embodies the traits of a Type 1, driven by a strong moral compass and a desire for justice.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: type 6 - the loyalist (70%)

Suggestions

Highlight Murphy's desire for order and justice to amplify his Type 1 characteristics.
Explore his loyalty in relationships further to echo Type 6 traits.

Follow-up Questions

How does Murphy’s Type 1 perspective affect his interactions with others?
In what ways do his Type 6 tendencies influence his decision-making in pressure?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (1)

Murphy's voiceover captures the complexities of the narco-trafficking world, revealing his insights and moral dilemmas.

Why: This scene effectively establishes his character's perspective and foreshadows the challenges he will face.

Weakest Scene (2)

Murphy struggles to balance his personal life while trying to fulfill his responsibilities as a DEA agent.

Why: This scene lacks emotional depth as it primarily shows him reacting to chaos without exploring his internal conflict.

Suggestions:

Add more internal monologue to convey Murphy’s feelings and conflicts in this scene.
Introduce dialogue with Connie to showcase their emotional dynamic.

Javier - Score: 67/100

Role

Supporting Character

Personality

MBTI: ISTJ
Enneagram: Type 1 - The Reformer

Scenes

Strongest: #3

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 7/10

DEA agent dedicated to justice.

Complexity And Depth 6/10

Struggles with moral dilemmas.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 5/10

Steadfast in pursuit of justice while facing pressures.

Dialogue And Voice 6/10

Speaks with authority and a sense of seriousness.

Behavior And Choices 7/10

Makes calculated decisions based on justice and morality.

Relationship Dynamics 8/10

Dynamic relationships with fellow agents enhance depth.

Scene Impact 7/10

Presence heightens stakes in pivotal scenes.

Role Fulfillment 6/10

Acts as a crucial ally in the fight against narcos.

Thematic Plot Integration 7/10

Embodies the struggle between good and evil.

Emotional Resonance 8/10

Engenders empathy through moral struggles.

Foundational Definition

Score: 7

Javier Peña is a key member of the DEA whose foundational role is to enforce drug laws in Colombia during a turbulent time dominated by powerful drug cartels. He exhibits a strong moral compass and commitment to justice, distinguishing him from the corrupt environment around him. His values of integrity, loyalty to his colleagues, and determination to rid Colombia of drug trafficking influence every decision he makes, grounding him as a reliable ally in the fight against narco-trafficking.

Values And Beliefs: Integrity, Loyalty, Justice

Strengths And Skills: Investigative skills, Strong moral compass, Team player

Suggestions

Further illustrate his motivations for joining the DEA.
Highlight his relationships with other characters to explore his complexities.

Follow-up Questions

What drives Peña to endure the dangers in Colombia?
How do Peña's values contrast with others in the DEA or local law enforcement?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 6

Peña carries an emotional weight due to the high stakes of his job and the violence surrounding him. His internal conflicts arise from watching innocent lives lost due to the drug war and balancing his duty with the risks to personal lives, especially considering the implications for his colleagues and families. The tension from his commitment to his job yet desire for peace reflects a deep complexity that shapes his character's behavior throughout the narrative.

Character Wound: Witnessing the impact of drug-related violence on innocent lives.

Character Flaws: Occasional overreach due to frustration, Difficulty connecting emotionally

Suggestions

Show instances of Peña grappling with guilt over collateral damage.
Create scenarios where Peña's decisions lead to unintended consequences.

Follow-up Questions

How does Peña cope with the emotional toll of his work?
In what ways might Peña's sense of justice lead to conflicts with others?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 5

Over the course of the screenplay, Peña's character is consistently defined by his steadfastness and moral alignments, although he does encounter instances that challenge his views and methods. The developments in his relationships, especially with characters like Murphy, serve as catalysts for his growth, leading to increasing awareness of the consequences of his work while maintaining his foundational beliefs about justice.

Polarity Changes: Peña experiences both victories and losses, particularly in his interactions with drug lords.

Transformation Triggers: Key investigations or losses that challenge his views on justice and friendship.

Suggestions

Provide pivotal moments that test Peña's resolve.
Reveal how relationships with other characters influence his character development.

Follow-up Questions

What specific events cause Peña to reassess his methods?
How do his relationships evolve as the drug war intensifies?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 6

Peña’s dialogue often reflects his authoritative role as a DEA agent, utilizing straightforward and commanding language that showcases his confidence and conviction. His moments of levity and sarcasm with colleagues act as a coping mechanism, revealing a human side beneath his tough exterior, emphasizing his reliance on camaraderie to handle the stress of their dangerous work.

Unique Voice: Often uses direct, no-nonsense language; sometimes employs moments of humor to cope with stress.

Suggestions

Incorporate subtle humor to further humanize Peña during tense situations.
Develop a more distinct speech pattern that reflects his background and experiences.

Follow-up Questions

How does Peña's tone shift in different contexts—when addressing superiors vs. colleagues?
What causes Peña to let his guard down, and how does this affect his communication?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 7

Peña demonstrates a commitment to his job through calculated and often tactical decisions. His actions stem from a profound desire for justice, and while he sometimes bends the rules in the pressure cooker of the drug war, he struggles with the emotional consequences that arise from these decisions, showing layers of complexity and conflict in his choices.

Motivations: To dismantle drug trafficking operations and ensure justice.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires to capture criminals while needing emotional closure from the violence surrounding his work.

Suggestions

Show more moments where Peña grapples with ethical dilemmas in the field.
Include scenes that explore the fallout from Peña’s decisions more intimately.

Follow-up Questions

What recurring situations challenge Peña’s moral beliefs?
How do Peña’s choices impact his relationships with other agents?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 8

Peña’s relationships with other DEA agents, particularly Steve Murphy, reveal a complex web of support and rivalry, underscoring the difficulties they face in their demanding roles. His friendship with Murphy serves both as an anchor and a challenge, revealing the strain of their missions and highlighting how teamwork can bolster or complicate their pursuits in the drug war.

Suggestions

Enhance the portrayal of Peña’s camaraderie and rivalries within the DEA.
Include non-work-related interactions to explore deeper friendship layers.

Follow-up Questions

What challenges do Peña's relationships face as the narrative escalates?
How does Peña balance his professional connections with personal emotions?

Scene Impact

Score: 7

Peña’s involvement in key operations and investigations often raises the stakes, creating an environment of tension and urgency. His decisions during high-pressure moments significantly impact the outcomes of operations, adding depth and gravity to scenes where drug trafficking and law enforcement collide.

Suggestions

Create scenarios where Peña's presence shifts dynamics in critical action sequences.
Emphasize moments of tension by focusing on Peña’s emotional and physical reactions.

Follow-up Questions

In what scenes does Peña most significantly change the dynamics?
How does Peña react when his decisions lead to unexpected consequences?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 6

Peña's character fulfills the role of an ally to the protagonist while also serving as a foil to other, more ruthless characters in the story. His adherence to principles of justice contrasts sharply with the lawlessness of the drug lords, driving home the central theme of morality in a world rife with corruption.

Symbolic Role: Represents the moral high ground amid corruption and violence.

Suggestions

Explore how Peña’s values challenge or complement the protagonist’s actions.
Evaluate Peña's response to adversity in a manner that aligns or contrasts with others.

Follow-up Questions

How does Peña’s role evolve as the stakes become higher?
What does Peña symbolize in contrast to antagonistic characters?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 7

Peña’s journey intertwines with the overarching themes of justice, morality, and the human cost of the drug trade. His trials and moral dilemmas exemplify the broader conflicts faced by those combating drug trafficking, positioning him as a crucial component in reflecting the core themes of the screenplay.

Suggestions

Highlight Peña's internal conflicts more to accentuate thematic relevance.
Draw connections between Peña’s actions and the impact of the drug war on society.

Follow-up Questions

How does Peña’s character arc reflect broader societal issues presented in the screenplay?
What specific moments of conflict reveal thematic tensions through Peña’s eyes?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 8

Peña effectively engages audiences due to his mixture of determination and vulnerability. The emotional weight of witnessing violence, coupled with his steadfastness in the pursuit of justice, creates a layered character that audiences can relate to, provoking sympathy and investment in his journey.

Emotional Impact: Elicits a sense of sympathy and tension.

Suggestions

Add poignant moments illustrating Peña's vulnerabilities to strengthen resonance.
Create scenarios that involve personal stakes to heighten emotional impact.

Follow-up Questions

What specific emotional responses do Peña’s actions elicit in viewers?
How can Peña’s internal struggles amplify the audience's connection to him?

Personality Types

MBTI: istj

Peña exhibits traits consistent with the ISTJ personality type, such as his focus on duty, responsibility, and a systematic approach to problem-solving in his professional role, while being more reserved emotionally.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: isfj (70%)

Suggestions

Utilize Peña’s ISTJ traits to deepen his interactions with less structured characters.
Explore how Peña’s responsibilities often clash with his personal desires.

Follow-up Questions

How might Peña's personality type affect his interpersonal conflicts?
What role does Peña's personality play in terms of leadership qualities within the DEA?

Enneagram: type 1 - the reformer

Peña's strong sense of ethics, drive for justice, and desire to improve the corruption in his environment align with the motivations typical of a Type 1 personality.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: type 6 - the loyalist (65%)

Suggestions

Add layers to his character by showing more of his ethical dilemmas.
Explore how Peña's loyalty to the DEA could lead to conflicts when pushed to choose between law and morality.

Follow-up Questions

How does Peña’s desire for justice manifest in pressure situations?
What ethical dilemmas might push Peña to reconsider his strict adherence to rules?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (3)

Peña's impactful presence in the DEA offices illustrates his importance in the ongoing battle against drug trafficking, showcasing his interactions with DEA operations and showcasing his skills effectively.

Why: Stands out as pivotal due to his role in coordinating efforts against major narcos.

Weakest Scene (0)

none

Why: none

Suggestions:

none
none

Cockroach - Score: 70/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ENTP
Enneagram: Type 3 (Achiever)

Scenes

Strongest: #12
Weakest: #3

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 7/10

Opportunistic and self-serving drug dealer.

Complexity And Depth 6/10

Flawed opportunist caught in betrayal.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 8/10

Betrayal leads to ultimate destruction.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

Sharp and self-serving communication.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

Driven by greed, leading to destructive choices.

Relationship Dynamics 6/10

Transactional and fluctuating relationships.

Scene Impact 8/10

High stakes energy propelling conflict.

Role Fulfillment 7/10

A symbol of betrayal in the drug world.

Thematic Plot Integration 7/10

Embodies the themes of greed and betrayal.

Emotional Resonance 6/10

Elicits tension without deep sympathy.

Foundational Definition

Score: 7

Cockroach is introduced as a low-level drug dealer in the chaotic world of cocaine trafficking. He is portrayed as a self-serving individual who prioritizes his profit above loyalty, even to his partners. His opportunistic nature and ability to survive under harsh circumstances shape his identity as he navigates the treacherous dynamics of the drug trade.

Values And Beliefs: Greed, survival, self-preservation.

Strengths And Skills: Resourcefulness in the drug trade, ability to manipulate situations.

Suggestions

Explore Cockroach's motivations for betrayal in more depth to add complexity.
Show interactions with other characters that highlight his self-serving nature.

Follow-up Questions

What experiences led Cockroach to adopt such a ruthless outlook?
How does Cockroach justify his actions to himself as the narrative develops?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 6

Cockroach embodies the deep emotional wound of betrayal and mistrust, stemming from a violent environment where loyalty is fleeting. His character flaw lies in his inability to maintain true partnerships, which ultimately leads to his downfall. This internal conflict drives many of his decisions, pushing him into opportunism rather than true cooperation.

Character Wound: Fear of losing power and resources.

Character Flaws: Lack of loyalty, greed, self-destructive tendencies.

Suggestions

Incorporate flashbacks to his earlier life to showcase how his environment shaped him.
Add scenes that reveal his internal conflicts and fears.

Follow-up Questions

What pivotal moments contribute to his worldview?
How do his fears ultimately drive his decisions throughout the plot?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 8

Cockroach does not undergo an apparent transformation throughout the story. Rather, he remains consistently self-serving and ruthless, which leads to his undoing. His greed drives him to betray Pablo Escobar, only to find himself killed for this disloyalty, indicating that his lack of transformation is central to his arc.

Polarity Changes: Rises to power through deceit, ends up dead due to betrayal.

Transformation Triggers: Arrest and subsequent betrayal by coworkers.

Suggestions

Include a moment of reflection where Cockroach considers the consequences of his actions.
Highlight the moments leading up to his betrayal to emphasize the instability of his position.

Follow-up Questions

What could have changed Cockroach's fate had he chosen loyalty?
How does his steadfast character influence those around him?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

Cockroach's dialogue reflects his opportunistic nature. He often uses persuasive language aimed at achieving personal benefits, showcasing a lack of concern for others. His speech is direct and calculated, revealing his understanding of the high-stakes drug environment.

Unique Voice: Brash and manipulative speech patterns; often focused on gain.

Suggestions

Add more layered dialogue that shows his internal thoughts.
Create exchanges with other characters that challenge his worldview.

Follow-up Questions

What are the key phrases Cockroach uses that define his character?
How does his dialogue change when confronted with authority or danger?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

Throughout the screenplay, Cockroach's actions demonstrate a clear motivation driven by greed. His choices are often made in self-interest, prioritizing immediate benefits over long-term security or relationships. Ultimately, this leads to his demise, showcasing the dangers of his approach.

Motivations: Maximizing profit while minimizing risk.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires wealth and power, needs to establish lasting alliances.

Suggestions

Delve deeper into moments that illustrate his decision-making process.
Portray the consequences of his behavior on his relationships with others.

Follow-up Questions

What does Cockroach's behavior reveal about the drug trade's nature?
How do his decisions resonate with the overarching themes of loyalty and betrayal?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 6

Cockroach's relationships are largely defined by transactions and opportunism. His dynamic with Pablo illustrates the caution and mistrust inherent in the drug world, leading to betrayal. While he initially seems to benefit from these connections, they ultimately contribute to his downfall.

Suggestions

Show how his relationships evolve or deteriorate over time.
Include key interactions that foreground trust issues.

Follow-up Questions

How do the dynamics between Cockroach and other characters highlight the dangers of betrayal?
What relationships could be further explored to enhance his narrative?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

Cockroach's presence in scenes amplifies the tension, serving as both a facilitator of chaos and a pivotal player in the drug trade. His actions often catalyze critical events, influencing the plot's direction and character motivations among others.

Suggestions

Maximize moments where Cockroach's choices directly impact plot developments.
Ensure his presence leads to necessary tensions that drive other characters.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cockroach's impact serve to escalate conflict in scenes?
What moments could be improved to demonstrate his influence more clearly?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 7

Cockroach serves a key narrative function as an antagonist whose choices ultimately reflect the themes of loyalty and treachery. His actions impact both his fate and the broader conflict within the drug trade, highlighting the stakes involved.

Symbolic Role: Represents treachery and its consequences.

Suggestions

Develop more explicit contrasts between his character and others that symbolize loyalty.
Focus on how his actions set the stage for larger conflicts.

Follow-up Questions

How effectively does Cockroach symbolize the themes of the screenplay?
In what ways might his role be further amplified in key scenes?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 7

Cockroach's narrative journey encapsulates central themes of the screenplay, particularly the destructive nature of greed and the inevitable fallout of betrayal. His character serves as a warning of the perils present in the high-stakes drug world.

Suggestions

Connect his story arc more explicitly to the broader themes.
Include moments that showcase the consequences of his greed.

Follow-up Questions

How does Cockroach's journey reflect the larger narrative themes?
What specific instances amplify his connection to the screenplay's moral lessons?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 6

While Cockroach elicits tension, he may not generate as much sympathy from the audience due to his self-serving nature. His choices bring a sense of unease and anticipation regarding the consequences of his actions on other characters.

Emotional Impact: Tension and unease regarding betrayal.

Suggestions

Integrate moments of vulnerability or fear to invoke greater audience empathy.
Explore relationships that might reveal facets of his character.

Follow-up Questions

What emotional responses do Cockroach's actions evoke in scenes?
How can his narrative be framed to enhance emotional stakes?

Personality Types

MBTI: entp

Cockroach displays traits typical of the ENTP personality type, characterized by their resourcefulness, cleverness, and willingness to exploit any situation for gain.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: estp (70%)

Suggestions

Consider how his ENTP traits influence interactions with other characters.
Explore scenes that exemplify his ingenuity.

Follow-up Questions

What specific behaviors correspond with the ENTP type in Cockroach's character?
How might the ESTP traits offer an alternative lens to understand him?

Enneagram: type 3 (achiever)

Cockroach exhibits Type 3 characteristics through his drive for success, achievement, and recognition in the drug trade, often at the expense of others.

Confidence: 75%

Possible Alternative Type: type 8 (challenger) (60%)

Suggestions

Highlight how his internal ambition conflicts with his external actions.
Show interactions that emphasize his competitive nature.

Follow-up Questions

In what scenes do Type 3 traits most significantly influence his decisions?
How do Type 8 elements complicate his character in the narrative?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (12)

Cockroach's betrayal emerges as a pivotal moment, where his decisions lead to his death.

Why: This scene encapsulates the themes of loyalty and betrayal central to the narrative, deeply resonating with the audience.

Weakest Scene (3)

Cockroach's character is less impactful, serving mainly as a plot device without depth or engaging dialogue.

Why: The scene does not provide an opportunity for characterization or significant action.

Suggestions:

Add dialogue that showcases his cunning or self-interest.
Integrate moments where his motivations become clear.

La - Score: 75/100

Role

Antagonist

Personality

MBTI: ESTP
Enneagram: 8

Scenes

Strongest: #13

Character Analysis Overview

Foundational Definition 8/10

Pablo Escobar's loyal hitman embodying violence and loyalty.

Complexity And Depth 6/10

Emotional wounds tied to violence and the criminal lifestyle.

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis 5/10

La Quica remains a consistent enforcer of Escobar's will, showing little personal growth.

Dialogue And Voice 7/10

La Quica's speech is likely terse, aggressive, and direct, aligning with his ruthless personality.

Behavior And Choices 8/10

La Quica chooses violence over negotiation, underscoring his role within the cartel.

Relationship Dynamics 9/10

La Quica's relationships are primarily based on loyalty and fear, especially towards Escobar.

Scene Impact 8/10

La Quica adds tension and danger to scenes involving him.

Role Fulfillment 9/10

La Quica serves as a primary enforcer and antagonist.

Thematic Plot Integration 8/10

La Quica's journey intersects with themes of loyalty and violence.

Emotional Resonance 7/10

Evokes tension and fear through his violent nature.

Foundational Definition

Score: 8

La Quica is introduced as a hitman who works for Pablo Escobar. His role indicates a commitment to the violent world of drug trafficking and assassination. By being part of Pablo's inner circle, La Quica's foundational traits are steeped in loyalty to his employer, a strong understanding of the criminal underworld, and a readiness to employ extreme violence to achieve goals. This positions him as a three-dimensional antagonist embedded in the drug trade’s complexity.

Values And Beliefs: Loyalty to Pablo Escobar; valuing strength and power in the criminal hierarchy.

Strengths And Skills: Skilled in combat and assassination; knowledge of drug cartel operations.

Suggestions

Develop backstory that explores La Quica's motivations and history to give depth to his character.
Show interaction with other characters to highlight his loyalty and ruthless nature.

Follow-up Questions

What events in La Quica's past might have shaped his commitment to violence?
How does La Quica's loyalty to Pablo Escobar influence his decisions?

Complexity And Depth

Score: 6

La Quica’s character likely carries emotional wounds related to his environment, as someone who has become numb to violence or trapped in a cycle of crime. This may lead to inner conflicts, revealing that underneath his tough exterior is someone who may struggle with morality or fear of betrayal. Considering he works as a hitman, exploring vulnerability can enhance the texture of his character.

Character Wound: None revealed directly in the text.

Character Flaws: Over-reliance on violence; possible emotional detachment.

Suggestions

Introduce moments of doubt or hesitation during violent acts.
Provide glimpses of La Quica's life outside crime to showcase a contrasting vulnerability.

Follow-up Questions

What drives La Quica to continue his violent lifestyle despite the risks?
Can La Quica's emotional state be explored through interaction with victims or families of victims?

Arc Or Purposeful Stasis

Score: 5

Throughout the narrative, La Quica does not undergo significant change or growth. His character is depicted as a faithful enforcer, understanding his role within the drug cartel but perhaps missing the implications of the violence he partakes in. The decision to keep him static could serve to emphasize the dangers of becoming entangled in such a ruthless world.

Polarity Changes: None; remains loyal to Pablo throughout.

Transformation Triggers: None present, remains consistently violent.

Suggestions

Explore potential turning points or events that challenge La Quica's loyalty.
Introduce moments where La Quica must choose between loyalty to Escobar and personal morality.

Follow-up Questions

What moments could challenge La Quica’s perception of loyalty?
How might external events force La Quica to confront his choices?

Dialogue And Voice

Score: 7

La Quica’s dialogue serves to reinforce his menacing presence in the screenplay. His speech patterns may be marked by directness and authority, reflecting his role as a hitman. Variations in tone could suggest fluctuating confidence or frustration, particularly in tense situations. As such, analyzing this aspect can offer deeper insights into his psychological state.

Unique Voice: Use of blunt, threatening language; reflects a possible lack of empathy.

Suggestions

Incorporate variations in tone during critical scenes to show La Quica’s emotional state.
Utilize inner monologues to express his thoughts, fears, or doubts.

Follow-up Questions

What specific phrases does La Quica use that highlight his character traits?
How does La Quica’s dialogue interact with characters like Pablo Escobar?

Behavior And Choices

Score: 8

La Quica’s decisions to engage in violent acts are driven by his desire to impress Escobar and maintain his status. His choices inevitably lead him deeper into conflict, exposing him to risks and ramifications. This behavior suggests a keen understanding of how the drug world operates but lacks consideration for long-term consequences.

Motivations: Complete loyalty to Pablo and pursuit of power within the drug trade.

Desires Vs Needs: Desires power and respect; needs to navigate personal ethics around violence.

Suggestions

Develop scenarios where La Quica must weigh options between violence and strategic restraint.
Show interactions that reveal his character's moral compass, adding depth to his choices.

Follow-up Questions

What internal conflicts does La Quica face upon executing orders from Pablo?
How does La Quica justify his violent choices to himself?

Relationship Dynamics

Score: 9

La Quica’s connection to Pablo Escobar is central to his character, showcasing a complex dynamic of fear, loyalty, and possibly admiration. This relationship drives many of his actions, revealing a fierce commitment to the cartel while also hinting at the potential volatility of such loyalty, especially if trust is broken.

Suggestions

Develop scenes that showcase La Quica's loyalty tested by events or other characters.
Explore the dynamics of fear and respect in his interactions with other cartel members.

Follow-up Questions

How would La Quica react if Pablo were to become vulnerable or make a mistake?
What does La Quica learn from his relationships with other cartel members?

Scene Impact

Score: 8

La Quica’s presence serves as a catalyst for conflict, often escalating situations due to his violent tendencies. His actions can pivot a scene from mere dialogue to life-or-death stakes, thereby heightening the overall tension. The intimidation he brings raises emotional stakes for main characters, influencing their decisions and actions.

Suggestions

Maximize La Quica's presence in scenes to create more palpable tension.
Introduce scenes where his absence leads to a false sense of security or overlooked threats.

Follow-up Questions

How does La Quica's involvement shape the choices of characters like Pablo?
In what ways might other characters react differently around La Quica compared to his absence?

Role Fulfillment

Score: 9

La Quica fits into the role of a classic antagonist for the protagonist's journey. His actions and decisions are driving forces in shaping the chaos around the drug trade. He embodies the extreme violence that comes with the world of narcotics while remaining a loyal servant of Pablo, thus serving a duality of menace and dependence.

Symbolic Role: Embodiment of violence and loyalty within the cartel structure.

Suggestions

Highlight moments that showcase La Quica as a foil to the protagonist.
Examine opportunities where La Quica's actions can reveal deeper cartel dynamics.

Follow-up Questions

How is La Quica's loyalty to Pablo pivotal to the progression of the plot?
What moments reinforce La Quica’s role as an antagonist against the main characters?

Thematic Plot Integration

Score: 8

La Quica embodies central themes such as loyalty to authority and the consequences of violence. His character underscores the moral decay and danger within the drug trade, offering a stark perspective on the cost of such loyalty. Through his journey, the screenplay can explore the darker sides of ambition and commitment, aligning with themes that resonate throughout the narrative.

Suggestions

Weave La Quica into themes regarding loyalty and betrayal more explicitly.
Use La Quica’s actions as a means to question the ethics of loyalty within the cartel.

Follow-up Questions

How does La Quica's depiction help to reinforce the central theme of power dynamics?
What paradoxes or contradictions exist in La Quica’s character related to loyalty?

Emotional Resonance

Score: 7

La Quica's violent actions and unwavering loyalty cause audience members to experience a range of emotions, from fear to tension as they witness the levels of brutality involved. His character forces viewers to confront the darker aspects of human nature tied to power and violence. His memorable portrayals might leave a lasting impression, emphasizing the emotional weight of the narrative’s stakes.

Emotional Impact: Creates tension and fear, reflecting the violence of the drug trade.

Suggestions

Enhance emotional stakes through family connections or past relationships.
Allow La Quica moments to exhibit vulnerability or internal conflict to increase emotional sway.

Follow-up Questions

How can La Quica's backstory resonate emotionally with audiences?
In what moments can La Quica provoke sympathy or understanding despite his violent tendencies?

Personality Types

MBTI: estp

La Quica displays traits of being action-oriented, adaptable, and pragmatic, characteristic of ESTP types who thrive in excitement, often showing a lack of concern for long-term implications.

Confidence: 80%

Possible Alternative Type: entp (70%)

Suggestions

Consider exploring more about La Quica's immediate reactions to unexpected situations to emphasize his ESTP traits.
Show how he uses improvisation in critical situations within the narrative.

Follow-up Questions

What situations showcase La Quica’s adaptability in terms of quick decision-making?
How do his ESTP traits influence his relationships with other cartel members?

Enneagram: 8

La Quica's strong personality, aggressive tendencies, and need for control fit the Enneagram Type 8 descriptors, known for asserting power and challenges.

Confidence: 85%

Possible Alternative Type: 3 (60%)

Suggestions

Delve into how La Quica's need for control affects his dynamics within the cartel.
Consider showing interactions where La Quica’s pride in power is challenged.

Follow-up Questions

What drives La Quica's aggressive behavior beyond simple loyalty?
How might La Quica's personality traits conflict with other characters in pivotal moments?

Key Scenes

Strongest Scene (13)

La Quica's involvement in the assassination attempt at the courthouse showcases his cold resolve and sharply enhances the narrative tension.

Why: This scene solidifies his role as a significant antagonist and illustrates the extreme violence of drug cartels.

Weakest Scene (0)

none

Why: none

Suggestions:

none

Theme

Theme Details

Theme Explanation

Good vs. Evil (90%)

It explores the complexities of morality, demonstrating that good people can make bad decisions, and vice versa.

The screenplay examines the actions of both the DEA agents and the drug cartels, highlighting that ethical considerations are not always clear-cut.

Strengthening Good vs. Evil:

Suggestion Type	How to Strengthen the Theme
Dialogue - Scene 2	Incorporate a line where Murphy acknowledges the complexities of good and evil, stating that definitions can be fluid and subjective, reinforcing the theme that both good and evil can coexist within individuals and situations.
Visual - Scene 5	Enhance the visual impact of Escobar's ruthlessness by depicting the aftermath of his attack on the finca guests, showcasing the brutality and far-reaching consequences of his actions.
Character Arc - Scene 10	Expand on Cockroach's transformation from a low-level drug dealer to a ruthless traitor, emphasizing his gradual descent into darkness and the erosion of his initial survival instincts.
Action - Scene 14	Include a scene where Murphy faces a moral dilemma in choosing between avenging his fallen comrades and upholding ethical conduct, showcasing the internal struggle between good and evil within him.
Story Arc - Scene N/A	Weave in flashbacks or interludes that explore the historical and political context of the drug war, highlighting the systemic corruption and moral ambiguities that contribute to the conflict between good and evil.

The Power of Corruption (80%)

It shows how corruption can permeate society, affecting everyone from politicians and police officers to ordinary citizens.

The screenplay portrays how the drug trade corrupts individuals and institutions, blurring the lines between right and wrong.

The Importance of Determination (70%)

It demonstrates the power of determination and resilience in the face of adversity.

The DEA agents' relentless pursuit of the cartels, despite setbacks and danger, showcases the importance of perseverance.

The Devastating Consequences of Violence (60%)

It depicts the brutal violence of the drug trade, showcasing its devastating impact on individuals, families, and communities.

The screenplay graphically portrays the violence inflicted by the cartels, highlighting the human cost of drug trafficking.

The Impact of Childhood Trauma (50%)

It delves into the childhood experiences of Pablo Escobar and others, examining how trauma can shape one's actions.

The screenplay explores the formative years of key characters, showing how their past traumas influence their present decisions.

The Search for Redemption (40%)

It shows the characters' struggles to atone for their past mistakes, seeking redemption and a chance to make things right.

The screenplay depicts the characters' attempts to overcome their past actions, highlighting the human capacity for growth and redemption.

The Complexity of Family (30%)

It examines the complex dynamics of family relationships, exploring love, loyalty, and betrayal.

The screenplay portrays the challenges and bonds within families, showing how family ties can both support and hinder individuals.

Screenwriting Resources on Themes

Articles

Site	Description
Studio Binder	Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters
Coverfly	Improving your Screenplay's theme
John August	Writing from Theme

YouTube Videos

Title	Description
Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics	Screenwriting basics - beginner video
What is theme	Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay.
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script	Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts

Goals and Philosophical Conflict
internal Goals	The protagonist's internal goal is to take down drug traffickers and seek justice for innocent victims. Their external goal is to track and capture criminals involved in the drug trade.
External Goals	The protagonist's external goal is to coordinate with law enforcement and carry out covert operations to capture criminals.
Philosophical Conflict	The protagonist's journey involves the moral ambiguity of surveillance and espionage in the fight against drug trafficking.

Character Development Contribution: The internal and external goals challenge the protagonist's beliefs and values, leading to growth and reflection. The philosophical conflicts push the protagonist to question their moral compass and make difficult decisions.

Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the plot forward, creating tension and conflict that propel the story. They also provide a framework for character development and thematic exploration.

Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts deepen the exploration of justice, morality, and power dynamics in the world of drug trafficking. They raise questions about the grey areas between right and wrong, highlighting the complexities of the criminal underworld.

Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Articles

Site	Description
Creative Screenwriting	How Important Is A Character’s Goal?
Studio Binder	What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict

YouTube Videos

Title	Description
How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict	How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode.
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great	By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals	By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy?

What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \ It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.

Abbreviate Headers

Story Content

Character Development

Scene Elements

Audience Engagement

Technical Aspects

			Story Content			Character Development				Scene Elements					Audience Engagement				Technical Aspects
Click for Full Analysis	Tone	Overall	Concept	Plot	Originality	Characters	Character Changes	Internal Goal	External Goal	Conflict	Opposition	High stakes	Story forward	Twist	Emotional Impact	Dialogue	Engagement	Pacing	Formatting	Structure
1 - Tracking Poison: The DEA vs. The Cartels	Urgent, Complex, Fast-paced, Hard-hitting, Epic	8	8	8	9	7	6	8	7	9	8	9	9	8	7	8	9	9	8	8
2 - Takedown at La Dispensaria	Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Action-packed	9	9	8	9	8	6	8	9	9	8	10	9	8	7	7	9	9	8	8
3 - The Morality of War	Serious, Reflective, Informative	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	7	8	7	8	8	8	7	9	8	8	8
4 - The Dark World of Drug Smuggling	Dark, Intense, Informative	8	9	7	9	8	5	8	7	7	7	7	8	8	6	6	9	8	8	8
5 - The Rise of Pablo Escobar	Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Menacing	9	9	8	9	9	7	8	9	9	8	9	9	8	8	9	9	9	9	9
6 - Cocaine Business Proposal and DEA Arrest	Dark, Intense, Suspenseful	8	8	7	9	9	6	8	7	8	8	8	9	8	7	8	9	9	8	8
7 - The Prank	Humorous, Light-hearted, Sarcastic	8	7	7	8	8	5	8	7.5	3	8	2	5	8	6	8	9	8	8	8
8 - Cocaine Smuggling Operation	Dark, Intense, Suspenseful, Mysterious	8	8	7	9	7	5	8	7	8	8	9	9	8	6	6	9	8	8	8
9 - Cocaine Smuggling at Miami International Airport	Dark, Intense, Suspenseful	9	9	8	9	9	7	8	7	9	8	10	9	8	8	8	9	9	8	8
10 - Jungle Negotiations	Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Businesslike	9	9	8	8	9	7	8	7	8	8	9	9	7	7	8	9	8	8	8
11 - Violent Night in Miami	Dark, Intense, Emotional	9	8	9	9	8	8	8	7	9	8	9	9	8	9	7	9	8	8	8
12 - Betrayal and Negotiation at Hacienda Napoles	Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Serious	8	8	8	9	8	7	8	7.5	9	8	9	9	9	7	9	9	8.5	8.5	8
13 - The Assassination of Zapata and Kevin	Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Dramatic	9	8	9	9	8	7	8	9	9	8	9	9	8	8	7	9	9	9	9
14 - The Battle Begins	Intense, Dark, Suspenseful	8	8	8	9	7	7	8	7.5	9	8	9	9	8	7	7	9	8.5	8	8

Summary of Scene Level Analysis

Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.

Scene Strengths

Intense atmosphere
Strong character dynamics
High-stakes conflict
Engaging dialogue
Compelling conflict

Scene Weaknesses

Limited emotional depth
Lack of character development
Focus on exposition over dialogue
Some clichéd dialogue in certain moments
Limited focus on character development

Suggestions

Explore the emotional depths of the characters more thoroughly
Develop and flesh out the characters more fully
Maintain a balance between exposition and dialogue
Avoid using clichéd dialogue
Ensure a strong focus on character development throughout the screenplay

World Building

Physical environment: The world of the screenplay is set in Colombia during the rise of narco-trafficking. The physical environment is diverse, with lush jungles, snow-capped volcanoes, and alpine lakes. The urban settings are chaotic and dangerous, with a heavy presence of law enforcement and drug-related violence.
Culture: The culture of the screenplay is heavily influenced by the drug trade. The wealthy landowners and politicians are involved in the cocaine business, while the peasants and the poor suffer the consequences of violence and corruption. The screenplay also depicts the Colombian-American cultural divide, as the DEA agents struggle to understand the complex social and political dynamics of Colombia.
Society: The societal structure of the screenplay is based on a hierarchy of power and corruption. The drug cartels are at the top, with the government and law enforcement often in their pockets. The people at the bottom of the hierarchy are the poor, who are often caught in the crossfire of the drug war.
Technology: The screenplay depicts a world where technology is used both to fight and facilitate the drug trade. The DEA uses surveillance technology to track the drug cartels, while the cartels use advanced weapons and communications systems to stay ahead of law enforcement.
Characters influence: The world of the screenplay shapes the characters' experiences and actions in a number of ways. The physical environment is often hostile and dangerous, forcing the characters to make difficult choices in order to survive. The culture of violence and corruption makes it difficult for the characters to trust each other, and the societal hierarchy makes it difficult for them to achieve justice.
Narrative contribution: The world of the screenplay contributes to the narrative by providing a setting for the action and by shaping the characters' motivations and actions. The physical environment is a constant source of danger, and the culture of violence and corruption makes it difficult for the characters to achieve their goals. The societal hierarchy also plays a role in the narrative, as the characters must navigate a complex web of power and corruption in order to achieve their goals.
Thematic depth contribution: The world of the screenplay contributes to the thematic depth by exploring the themes of violence, corruption, and redemption. The violence of the drug trade is a constant presence in the screenplay, and the characters are often forced to make difficult choices in order to survive. The corruption of the government and law enforcement is also a major theme, as the characters must navigate a complex web of power and corruption in order to achieve their goals. The screenplay also explores the theme of redemption, as the characters struggle to find meaning in a world that is often violent and corrupt.

Voice Analysis
Summary:	The writer's voice is characterized by its gritty, fast-paced dialogue, and intense visual descriptions. The narrative is driven by the author's unique perspective on the drug war, exploring its high stakes, moral complexities, and the personal sacrifices of those involved in the fight against it.
Voice Contribution	The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of urgency and tension, immersing the reader in the dangerous and often brutal world of drug trafficking. The use of vivid imagery and visceral language enhances the emotional impact of the story, allowing the reader to experience the physical and psychological toll of the drug war.
Best Representation Scene	1 - Tracking Poison: The DEA vs. The Cartels
Best Scene Explanation	Scene 1 effectively showcases the author's unique voice through its blend of action, dialogue, and gritty atmosphere. The fast-paced narrative and vivid descriptions create a sense of urgency and danger, establishing the high stakes and moral complexities of the drug trade.

Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:

Pattern	Explanation
High Scores in Concept and Plot
Dialogue and Emotional Impact Relationship
Low Humor and High Stakes
Complex Tone and Character Changes
Dark and Intense Style

Writer's Craft Overall Analysis

The analyzed screenplay showcases a strong foundation in storytelling techniques, character development, and dialogue. The writer effectively combines action, drama, and suspense to create engaging scenes that keep the audience invested in the narrative. However, there are areas where the writer can refine their craft to enhance the overall impact and depth of their writing.

Key Improvement Areas

Character Development

Several scenes highlight the need for stronger character arcs and motivations. Some characters appear underdeveloped, and their actions and decisions lack emotional depth and complexity.

Dialogue

While the dialogue is generally well-written, there are instances where it can be more natural and authentic. The writer can focus on creating unique character voices and ensuring the dialogue serves the purpose of advancing the plot and character development.

Pacing

The pacing of the screenplay could be improved in certain scenes. Some scenes drag on, while others feel rushed. The writer can benefit from practicing scene structuring and transitions to maintain a balanced and engaging flow throughout the narrative.

Suggestions

Type	Suggestion	Rationale
Book	Read 'The Anatomy of Story' by John Truby for in-depth insights into character development, plot structure, and storytelling techniques.	This book provides a comprehensive framework for understanding the essential elements of storytelling and can help the writer refine their character arcs and motivations.
Video	Watch interviews and masterclasses with experienced screenwriters to learn their perspectives on dialogue writing.	Listening to professionals discuss their craft can offer valuable insights into creating authentic and engaging dialogue that drives the narrative forward.
Exercise	Practice writing dialogue-heavy scenes with a focus on creating distinct character voices and natural speech patterns.Practice In SceneProv	Regularly practicing dialogue writing can help the writer improve their ability to craft believable and memorable characters.
Exercise	Analyze the pacing of successful screenplays by breaking them down into individual scenes and studying how the scenes transition and contribute to the overall flow.Practice In SceneProv	This exercise will enhance the writer's understanding of effective pacing and enable them to apply these techniques to their own work.
Course	Consider enrolling in a screenwriting course or workshop to receive personalized feedback and guidance from experienced industry professionals.	Structured learning opportunities can provide the writer with targeted support and mentorship, accelerating their growth and improving their craft.

Additional Notes: The writer has a strong grasp of the fundamentals of screenwriting and a clear passion for storytelling. With dedication and consistent practice, they can refine their skills and create even more compelling and impactful screenplays in the future.

Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay

Trope	Trope Details	Trope Explanation
Voiceover Introduction	The screenplay opens with a voiceover by DEA Agent Steve Murphy providing background information on the setting and characters.	Voiceover introductions are a common trope used in screenplays to quickly provide exposition and set the scene for the audience. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Dexter,' where the main character provides voiceover narration to give insight into his thoughts and motivations.
Shootout at a Drug Lord's Party	A shootout occurs at a drug lord's party, resulting in the deaths of several individuals, including the drug lord himself.	Shootouts at drug lord parties are a common trope in crime dramas and action films to establish the dangerous and violent world of drug trafficking. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Scarface,' where a similar shootout takes place at a drug lord's mansion.
Corrupt Police Officers	Pablo Escobar bribes police officers to allow his contraband trucks to pass through a checkpoint.	Corrupt police officers working for drug lords is a common trope in crime dramas to show the extent of criminal influence and corruption in law enforcement. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'The Wire,' where various police officers are shown to be on the payroll of drug dealers.
Flashback to Younger Characters	A flashback to young DEA agents Murphy and Kevin chasing after and arresting two surfers with a backpack full of marijuana.	Flashbacks to younger versions of characters are a common trope used to provide backstory and context for the main narrative. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Goodfellas,' where the main character's past as a young gangster is shown through flashbacks.
Betrayal by Underling	Cockroach betrays Pablo Escobar by selling him out to the authorities and running his own cocaine operation in Miami.	Betrayal by a trusted underling is a common trope in crime dramas to create tension and conflict within criminal organizations. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Breaking Bad,' where the main character's partner betrays him and starts his own drug empire.
Assassination Attempt	Two assassins open fire on DEA agents Zapata and Kevin, resulting in their deaths.	Assassination attempts on law enforcement officers are a common trope in crime dramas to raise the stakes and show the dangers faced by those fighting against criminal organizations. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Departed,' where an undercover cop is targeted for assassination by the mob.
Drug Smuggling Operation	Characters are involved in smuggling cocaine across borders using various methods, including hiding it in fish, olive oil cans, and coffee packages.	Drug smuggling operations are a common trope in crime dramas to show the intricate and risky nature of the illegal drug trade. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Traffic,' where different aspects of drug smuggling are explored through multiple storylines.
Ruthless Drug Lord	Pablo Escobar is introduced as a ruthless drug lord known for his intelligence, connections, and willingness to use violence.	Ruthless drug lords are a common trope in crime dramas to create a formidable antagonist for law enforcement and other characters. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Narcos,' which also depicts the rise and fall of Pablo Escobar.
Montage Sequence	A montage of historical footage and voiceover narration is used to explore the idea that good and bad are relative concepts.	Montage sequences are a common trope in screenplays to condense information and convey complex ideas or emotions through visual and auditory elements. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Godfather Part II,' where a montage is used to show the parallel rise of two characters in different time periods.
Cocaine Addiction Theme	Scenes depict characters using and smuggling cocaine, highlighting the theme of addiction and its consequences.	Themes of drug addiction and its impact on individuals and society are common tropes in crime dramas to explore the human cost of the drug trade. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'The Sopranos,' where the main character struggles with addiction and its effects on his family.

Memorable lines in the script:

Scene Number	Line
5	Pablo Escobar: Gentlemen, let me tell you who I am. I am Pablo Fucking Escobar. My eyes are everywhere. You can't do a goddamn thing in Antioquia without me knowing about it. I'm going to be President of Colombia one day.
11	Connie: The baby died in my hands.
13	Nancy Reagan: So to my young friends out there, life can be great. But not when you can't see it. So open your eyes to life, to see it in the vivid colors that God gave us as a precious gift to His children. Say yes to your life. And when it comes to drugs and alcohol, just say no.
8	Pablo: We'll take five.
1	Murphy: Now we owned him. And he didn't even know it.

Some Loglines to consider:

A gritty narrative exploring the rise of Pablo Escobar as the kingpin of the Medellín cartel and the DEA's relentless pursuit to bring him down.
An intense portrayal of the global drug trade, highlighting the complex dynamics between drug lords, law enforcement, and the victims caught in between.
From the jungles of Colombia to the streets of Miami, follow the explosive story of the drug war that shook the world.
Witness the transformation of a small-time smuggler into one of the world's most notorious criminals and the international effort to stop his empire.
Explore the moral ambiguities of the war on drugs through the intertwined lives of traffickers, cops, and innocents.

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Executive Producer: Chris Brancato
Executive Producer: Eric Newman
Executive Producer: Jose Padilha

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"Descenso"
Episode #101

Written by
Chris Brancato

Directed by
Jose Padilha

May 13, 2014

Cold Mountain Productions
Grand Electric
Note to the reader:

The assumption is that you've seen our director Jose Padilha's
"Elite Squad" films and that it has painted a picture for
you of what a modernist and masculine Latin American cinematic
approach feels like: urgent, complex, fast-paced, hard-hitting
and epic. And since you get it, you will also get that the
voice over you are about to read should not be experienced
like anything typical to Hollywood. The level at which the
images will confront you visually while Murphy's voice is in
your head are the full journey that guides you through this
descent from the birth of narco-trafficking into the darkness
of what men will do to WIN.
FADE UP ON:

EXT. ANDES MOUNTAIN RANGE - AERIAL VIEW - TWILIGHT

CAMERA SWOOPS over lush inland jungles, snow-capped volcanoes,
lush valleys, and alpine lakes.

OPERATOR #1 (O.S.)
Centra Spike is a go, we've reached
twenty thousand feet.

A small BEECHCRAFT AIRPLANE flies into FRAME.

OPERATOR #2 (O.S.)
Commencing intercept operations, we
are at zero-four-two-nine.

OPERATOR #1 (O.S.)
Encryption units, stand-by. Let's
crawl into some heads.

EXT. BOGOTA - AERIAL VIEW - NIGHT

The city twinkles, bounded by the eastern cordillera of the
Andes Mountain Range.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Nowadays, the U.S. government can
listen to anything you say. They
know where you are, they know who
you're talking to, they probably
know who you're fucking. Turn on a
cell phone and you're doomed.

A chyron appears: "Bogota, Colombia 1989"

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
But in Colombia in 1989, it wasn't
that easy. The only people who had
satellite phones were the filthy
rich. The landowners. The
politicians.

INT. FINCA - BOGOTA - NIGHT

CASH is stacked like cordwood.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Lucky for us, the Narcos were richer
than them all.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 2.

A couple of Makarov machine pistols lay on the table along
with a satellite phone. A HAND comes into FRAME.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Okay, good. He picked up the phone.

WIDENING, to reveal a mustachioed NARCO ("POISON") dialing a
number on his phone. A CONFEDERATE counts the cash.

POISON
(in Spanish)
Hello, Blackie? It's Poison. We're
going out tonight.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Now we owned him. And he didn't
even know it.

INT. BEECHCRAFT - NIGHT

Inside, we SEE a fifty-million-dollar spy plane crammed with
state-of-the-art electronic eavesdropping equipment. Two
MALE OPERATORS monitor calls on laptops.

MURPHY (V.O.)
We had software that identified the
specific voices of our targets.
When they talked, we listened.

AN ONBOARD COMPUTER

Providing instantaneous calculations. We HEAR the chatter
of intercepted phone calls in Spanish.

OPERATOR #1
We got Poison at 1400 to 1700
megahertz, gentlemen.

He scribbles notes on a pad: "POISON."

OPERATOR #2
Ground units, begin trilateration.

INT. VAN ON THE GROUND - NIGHT

Packed with surveillance gear. A TECHNICIAN in the back of
the van (American) checks his laptop.

TECHNICIAN
He's in the Zona Rosa.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 3.

OPERATOR #2 (O.S.)
Can you be more specific? Police
units are standing by.

INT. FINCA - BOGOTA - NIGHT

Poison knocks back an aguardiente.

POISON
(in Spanish)
La Dispensaria. I have a table
outside. Midnight.

INT. BEECHCRAFT - NIGHT

OPERATOR #1
Never mind. Negative on the ground
assault. This fuckwad just told us
where he's going.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Poison didn't know it, but he'd made
himself a date.

Operator #1 removes his headset.

OPERATOR #1
Who do we give this to? DEA?

OPERATOR #2
Yeah. Let's give it to Javier Peña.

OPERATOR #1
Peña's an asshole. I'm gonna give
it to the other guy.

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Urgent, Complex, Fast-paced, Hard-hitting, Epic

Summary In 1989 Colombia, DEA agents use satellite technology to track a wealthy drug lord named Poison. They triangulate his location and learn that he is planning to meet someone at a restaurant called La Dispensaria at midnight. The agents decide to give the information to another agent instead of Javier Peña.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Tense atmosphere
High-stakes conflict
Intriguing concept

Weaknesses

Character depth
Emotional engagement

General Critique

The scene opens with a strong visual of the Andes Mountains in Colombia, setting the tone for the rest of the script.
The use of voiceover by DEA Agent Steve Murphy effectively provides context and background information for the audience.
The introduction of the drug lord Poison and the surveillance operation to track his movements creates tension and intrigue.
The dialogue and actions of the characters feel authentic and engaging, drawing the audience into the story.
The scene effectively sets up the conflict and stakes for the rest of the script.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding more visual elements to enhance the aerial footage and make it more visually captivating.
Explore ways to further develop the characters of the DEA operators and their dynamics to add depth to the scene.
Consider incorporating more sensory details to immerse the audience in the setting and atmosphere of the scene.
Ensure that the transition between different locations and characters is smooth and seamless to maintain the flow of the scene.
Continue to build suspense and tension throughout the script to keep the audience engaged and invested in the story.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the high-stakes world of narco-trafficking, introduces key characters and technology, and creates a tense atmosphere that draws the audience in.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of using advanced surveillance technology to track narco-traffickers in Colombia in 1989 is intriguing and sets the stage for a complex and fast-paced narrative.

Plot: 8

The plot introduces key characters, establishes the setting and conflict, and sets up the central mission of tracking down the narco-traffickers.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug war in Colombia, with unique insights into surveillance tactics and the cat-and-mouse game between law enforcement and narcos. The dialogue feels authentic and the characters' actions are believable.

Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters are introduced effectively through their actions and dialogue, but there is room for further development and depth.

Character Changes: 6

While there are hints of character development, such as the reveal of Poison's unwitting betrayal, more significant changes are needed to drive the narrative forward.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to gather intelligence on the narcos and intercept their communications. This reflects their desire to protect their country and stop the drug trafficking.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to track down and capture the narcos, specifically Poison. This reflects the immediate challenge they are facing in dealing with the drug trade.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between the U.S. government and the narco-traffickers, as well as the internal conflicts within the characters, creates a high level of tension and suspense.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the narcos presenting a formidable challenge to the protagonist's mission. The uncertainty of the outcome adds to the tension and suspense.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of the mission to track down the narco-traffickers, the advanced surveillance technology at play, and the potential consequences of failure create a sense of tension and danger.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward by setting up the central conflict, introducing key plot points, and creating a sense of urgency.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the surveillance operation, keeping the audience on edge and unsure of the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict is between law enforcement and criminal activity, highlighting the moral ambiguity of surveillance and espionage in the fight against drug trafficking. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about justice and the means to achieve it.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of suspense and intrigue, but there is room for deeper emotional engagement with the characters.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, engaging, and reveals important information about the characters and their motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, fast-paced action, and suspenseful atmosphere. The audience is drawn into the intense world of drug trafficking and surveillance.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is expertly crafted, with a balance of action and exposition that keeps the audience engaged and builds tension effectively. The rhythm of the scene contributes to its overall effectiveness.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue. It is well-formatted and easy to follow.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively builds tension and sets up the conflict between the protagonist and the narcos. It adheres to the expected format for a thriller genre.

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - BOGOTA - NIGHT

STEVE MURPHY, 30s, stands amidst domestic chaos: a baby cries
loudly, the phone rings off the hook. He has the physicality
and charm of a West Virginia upbringing.

MURPHY (V.O.)
By the "other guy," he meant me. My
name is Steve Murphy. I'm DEA and
as you can see, I'm deeply embedded
in Colombia.

He receives into his arms a beautiful, crying COLOMBIAN BABY,
handed to him by CONNIE MURPHY, 30s.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 4.

CONNIE
Honey, can you change her?

Connie is effortlessly sexy, a former ER nurse. She moves
off to answer the phone. Murphy places the baby on the
changing table as though handling a live hand grenade.

CONNIE (O.S.) (CONT'D)
It's for you!

He grabs the phone, cradles it under his neck.

MURPHY
Hello?
(listens)
Okay. Hold on. Gimme a sec.

He puts the baby in her crib, and grabs a pen and scribbles
"Poison" and "La Dispensaria, 12AM" on a notepad.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Got it, thanks.

The baby starts to cry.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Hold on, sweetpea. Daddy's coming.

He dials another number.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
(on phone)
Poison will be at La Dispensaria at
around midnight with his crew.

Murphy grabs a new diaper from a stack.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
I would've loved to go after Poison
myself, but DEA is restricted in a
foreign country.

Murphy fumbles some talcum into the diaper. He lifts the
BABY'S TINY BOTTOM to put it on.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
We're not supposed to do ground
operations. Our role's to "inform"
and "advise." So I did just what
you would do. I called the cops.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 5.

EXT. CAFE - BOGOTA - NIGHT

HORATIO CARILLO, 30s, a well-dressed Colombian with a cheery
demeanor, talks on a clunky cell phone.

CARILLO
La Dispensaria. Copy that.

He clicks off, smiles at his dinner companion.

CARILLO (CONT'D)
Guess who that was? Your partner.

We see JAVIER PEÑA, 30s, Mexican-American, enjoying his
scotch. He's casual in a collared shirt and jeans.

CARILLO (CONT'D)
(rising)
Gotta go.

PEÑA
Gonna stick me with the bill, huh?

CARILLO
I have to get the gift your partner
just delivered.

PEÑA
No kidding. Who?

CARILLO
Poison.

He starts off, turns back.

CARILLO (CONT'D)
Does your buddy know how I'm gonna
package it?

PEÑA
Oh yeah. He's no fool. I'll get
the bill, you cheap sonofabitch.

Carillo turns and walks toward CAMERA.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Colonel Carillo was one of the leaders
of "Search Bloc," a unit we helped
create to capture the bad guys.
(MORE)
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 6.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
But at heart he was like any Colombian
police officer. He didn't have a
lot of love for the Narcos.

CUT TO:

CHA-CHUCK. A SHOTGUN is cocked.

CARILLO
(in Spanish)
We're on, fellas.

INT. SPECIAL OPS VAN - NIGHT

Carillo addresses six MEN IN BODY ARMOR. The van's an armory:
Browning rifles, H&K small machine guns, etc. The men pull
on ski masks.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Midnight in the Zona Rosa. Party
time.

EXT. LA DISPENSARIA - NIGHT

The Zona Rosa is alive with music, revelers, excitement.
SEVEN TOUGH MEN are seated at an outdoor table. Poison is
packing his Makarov in a fancy leather holster.

POISON
(in Spanish)
Come join us, beautiful!

He's propositioning a DOE-EYED COLOMBIAN GIRL walking down
the street. His men make catcalls.

ANGLE - THE DOE-EYED COLOMBIAN GIRL

She smiles, pretends she's interested. She knows better
than to ignore these men.

WIDE SHOT - LA DISPENSARIA

The restaurant. The beautiful girl. The dealers.

SURE SHOT
(in Spanish)
Hey, Beauty Queen! We're ugly but
we're rich!

BAM! His head blows off. Everyone goes for their weapons.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 7.

CAMERA WHIP PANS

The Men in Body Armor advance, guns blazing as we--

FREEZE FRAME

FADE TO BLACK.

A long beat. Dead silence.

FADE UP ON:

EXT. LA DISPENSARIA - SUNRISE

A SHUTTER clicks, a photo taken. Bodies lay splayed across
the outdoor cafe. A bloodbath.

MURPHY (O.S.)
Javi, we hit a home run.

REVERSING, to find Steve Murphy with a camera and a phone.
He steps into a cordoned crime scene, with EIGHT CORPSES and
a dozen COLOMBIAN NATIONAL POLICE.

MURPHY (O.S.) (CONT'D)
Got "Poison." We got "Bad Mouth."
We got "Blackie." Three or four of
them I can't ID.

Colonel Carillo squats over one of the corpses. He turns
his face TOWARDS CAMERA.

CARILLO
(in Spanish)
Murphy, you won't believe this.

He gestures to a dead body. Face half blown off.

MURPHY
Javier, we got a bonus. "Sure Shot"
has met his maker.
(another look)
At least I think it's "Sure Shot."

INTERCUT WITH:

CLOSE - ON JAVIER PEÑA

PEÑA
No shit! He was there?! Great.
NARCOS Ep. 101 "Descenso" 5/13/14 8.

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Action-packed

Summary DEA agent Steve Murphy informs the Colombian police about Poison's whereabouts, leading to a shootout at La Dispensaria. Poison and several of his men are killed, and Murphy documents the aftermath.

Strengths

Intense action
Suspenseful atmosphere
Realistic dialogue
Strong character dynamics

Weaknesses

Limited character development in this specific scene
Some clichéd dialogue in certain moments

General Critique

The scene starts with a chaotic domestic setting, which may distract from the main plot point of Poison's whereabouts being discovered.
The dialogue between Murphy and Connie feels a bit forced and cliched, lacking depth and authenticity.
The transition from Murphy receiving the phone call to him changing the baby's diaper feels abrupt and disjointed.
The voiceover narration by Murphy is informative but could be more engaging and emotionally resonant.
The introduction of Carillo and Peña at the cafe lacks tension and urgency, missing an opportunity to build suspense.
The action sequence at La Dispensaria is rushed and lacks proper buildup, making the shootout feel sudden and disconnected from the rest of the scene.
The freeze frame at the climax of the shootout feels cliched and interrupts the flow of the scene.
The transition from the shootout to the aftermath at sunrise is jarring and could be smoother to maintain continuity.
The dialogue between Murphy and Carillo at the crime scene feels stilted and lacks natural flow.
The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions and sensory details to immerse the audience in the setting and atmosphere.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider restructuring the scene to create a more seamless flow from the phone call to the shootout at La Dispensaria.
Focus on developing more authentic and nuanced interactions between characters, especially in moments of high tension.
Enhance the pacing of the action sequence by building suspense and escalating the stakes gradually.
Avoid cliched narrative devices like freeze frames and focus on creating a more dynamic and engaging visual storytelling approach.
Work on integrating the voiceover narration more organically into the scene to enhance the storytelling without disrupting the momentum.
Revise the dialogue to be more natural and reflective of the characters' personalities and motivations.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-written, engaging, and effectively conveys the tension and danger of the situation. It keeps the audience on the edge of their seats with its fast-paced action and dramatic developments.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a covert operation to capture a group of Narcos at a nightclub is compelling and executed with precision. It sets the stage for intense conflict and high stakes.

Plot: 8

The plot is driven by the mission to apprehend the Narcos, leading to a climactic showdown at the nightclub. It effectively builds tension and suspense throughout the scene.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the crime genre by exploring the complexities of law enforcement operations in a foreign country, with authentic character interactions and realistic dialogue.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Murphy, Carillo, and Peña, are well-defined and play crucial roles in the unfolding events. Their interactions and decisions drive the narrative forward.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character arcs in this scene, the characters' actions and decisions reveal more about their personalities and motivations, setting the stage for potential development in future scenes.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to successfully carry out a covert operation to capture criminals while navigating the restrictions of his role as a DEA agent in a foreign country.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to coordinate with local law enforcement to capture a criminal named Poison and his crew at La Dispensaria.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and multi-faceted, involving the clash between law enforcement and the Narcos, as well as the risks and challenges of the operation. It keeps the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the protagonist facing multiple challenges and obstacles in achieving his goals, adding complexity and unpredictability to the narrative.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are extremely high in the scene, as law enforcement officers risk their lives to take down a dangerous criminal group. The outcome of the operation could have far-reaching consequences for the characters and the overall story.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by resolving the immediate conflict with the Narcos and setting the stage for new developments and challenges. It propels the narrative towards the next phase of the story.

Unpredictability: 8

The scene is unpredictable due to unexpected plot twists, character decisions, and the high-risk nature of the operation.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the protagonist's adherence to rules and regulations as a DEA agent versus his desire to take direct action in capturing criminals.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a range of emotions from tension and suspense to shock and satisfaction. The high stakes and dramatic events create a strong emotional impact on the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is sharp and realistic, reflecting the urgency and high-stakes nature of the operation. It effectively conveys the characters' personalities and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its fast-paced action, high stakes, and character dynamics, keeping the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, maintaining a sense of urgency and momentum throughout.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format for a crime drama, effectively building tension and suspense through its pacing and character interactions.

INT. UNITED STATES EMBASSY - BOGOTA - DAY

Peña stands in the DEA offices of the Embassy, beside a "tree
chart" of numerous traffickers and sicarios (hit men).

MURPHY (V.O.)
Peña had wanted that motherfucker
off the tree for months.

PEÑA
I'm so happy I'll even forgive those
assholes at Centra Spike for giving
the intel to you.

MURPHY (O.S.)
Hell, I'm prettier than you are.

Peña removes a MUGSHOT of Juan Corrales Botero, aka "Sure
Shot," from the trafficker tree. He thinks of something,
stops yanking pictures--

PEÑA
Any humans involved?

MURPHY
Yeah. A bystander caught a stray.

ON MURPHY, walking toward a sprawled body.

CLOSE - ON THE DOE-EYED COLOMBIAN GIRL.

She lays face up, eyes glassy in death, a clean bullet hole
in her temple. Murphy's VOICE carries over--

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
I wouldn't blame you if you held me
responsible for this bloodbath.

CLICK. REVERSING, to find MURPHY, peering through his camera.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Yeah, I pushed the buttons. But
don't call me a bad guy just yet.

He lowers the camera as we --

FREEZE FRAME: MURPHY

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Good and bad are relative concepts.

CUT TO:
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PRESIDENT NIXON, giving a speech. (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

PRESIDENT NIXON
The more you stay in this kind of
job, the more you realize that a
public figure, a major public figure,
is a lonely man.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Take Richard Nixon, for instance.
People forget, but 47 million
Americans voted for Nixon. We thought
he was one of the good guys.

GENERAL PINOCHET, the dictator of Chile. (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

GENERAL PINOCHET
The rich people are those who create
wealth, and you have to treat them
well so they continue to give wealth.

MURPHY (V.O.)
And Nixon thought Chilean General
Augusto Pinochet was a good guy `cause
he hated the commies. So we helped
Pinochet seize power.

CHILEAN DEATH SQUADS, slaughter and civilian protest, the
March of the Disappeared. (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Then Pinochet turned around and killed
thousands of people. Maybe not such
a good guy after all.

EXT. JUNGLE - CHILE - DAY

Thick, forested northern Chile.

MURPHY (V.O.)
But sometimes bad guys do good things.
To kiss Nixon's ass, Pinochet went
after the cocaine labs.

EXT. DEEP JUNGLE LAB - CHILE - DAY

A tented jungle lab with white-smocked WORKERS.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Nobody knows this, but back in `73
Chile was on its way to being the
(MORE)
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MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
world's biggest cocaine processing
and exporting center. They had
jungles to hide the labs and miles
of unpatrolled coastline to send the
product north.

CUT TO:

CHILEAN SOLDIERS crash through the forest.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
But Pinochet spoiled the party. He
shut down 33 labs and arrested 346
drug dealers.

The SOLDIERS invade the lab. DRUG WORKERS quickly give
themselves up, lacing hands behind their heads. One of them
is MATEO MORENO, a low-level manager.

EXT. DEEP JUNGLE LAB - CHILE - LATER

A bunch of DEALERS, hands tied behind them, are lined up in
front of a firing squad.

MURPHY (V.O.)
And then-- being Pinochet-- he had
them all killed.

Moreno is scared shitless. His body quivers.

CHILEAN SOLDIER
(in Spanish)
Ready. Aim. Fire.

A FUSILLADE OF GUNFIRE. The dealers collapse.

EXT. JUNGLE - CHILE - LATER

SOLDIERS toss the bodies in a mass grave.

MURPHY (V.O.)
They say when a nuclear holocaust
destroys the world, only the
cockroaches will survive.

CLOSE - ON A MASS GRAVE

Beneath the corpses, there is movement. A solitary man fights
his way out of the grave, frantically pushing aside the bodies
to emerge, covered in blood.
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MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
I guess they were right.

CLOSE - MATEO MORENO, wild-eyed.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The bullets missed Mateo Moreno, aka
"Cockroach," and he was smart enough
to play dead. He wasn't killed on
that day...

INT. SHACK - CHILE - DAY

Cockroach bursts through the door.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Instead, he won the damn lottery.

His WIFE approaches, horrified.

COCKROACH
Start packing. We have to leave the
country. Pinochet wants to kill me.

COCKROACH'S WIFE
You're a communist?!

COCKROACH
No, I'm a fucking drug dealer!

CLOSE: ON A DRAWER

Cockroach slides it open to reveal a KILO OF COKE.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Cockroach had been stealing from his
bosses for months. Now he was left
alone in the world with the perfect
product. A product whose offer
creates its own demand.

CUT TO:

OVERHEAD SHOT - A MAZE

A RAT scurries through the maze at lightning speed.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Back then, we were just finding out
about the effects of cocaine on the
human brain. We didn't know much,
but we knew it was powerful shit.
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Genres: Crime, Drama, Historical
Tone: Serious, Reflective, Informative

Summary In a DEA office, an agent faces the ethical dilemma of a bystander's death during an operation. Through historical footage, the scene explores the complexities of good and evil, blurring the lines between right and wrong.

Strengths

Complex characters
Historical context
Reflective dialogue

Weaknesses

Lack of character development
Some scenes may be too informative

General Critique

The scene transitions abruptly from Peña removing a mugshot to Murphy walking towards a dead body, which can be disorienting for the audience.
The dialogue between Peña and Murphy feels a bit forced and unnatural, lacking in subtlety and depth.
The freeze frame of Murphy with the voiceover about good and bad being relative concepts feels cliché and heavy-handed, detracting from the overall impact of the scene.
The archival footage and voiceover narration about Nixon, Pinochet, and the Chilean death squads, while informative, disrupt the flow of the scene and may be too tangential to the main storyline.
The sudden shift to Mateo Moreno, aka 'Cockroach,' escaping a mass execution in Chile feels disconnected from the previous events and could be better integrated into the narrative.
The introduction of the rat in the maze and the mention of cocaine's effects on the human brain seem out of place and do not contribute significantly to the scene's development.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider restructuring the scene to create a smoother transition between Peña removing the mugshot and Murphy's interaction with the dead body.
Focus on developing more natural and nuanced dialogue between Peña and Murphy to enhance the authenticity of their interaction.
Reconsider the use of the freeze frame and voiceover about good and bad being relative concepts to avoid heavy-handedness and cliché.
Integrate the archival footage and voiceover about Nixon, Pinochet, and the Chilean death squads more seamlessly into the scene to maintain the narrative flow.
Find a more organic way to introduce Mateo Moreno, aka 'Cockroach,' and his backstory to ensure it aligns with the overall storyline and theme of the screenplay.
Evaluate the relevance of the rat in the maze and the discussion of cocaine's effects on the human brain to determine if they add value to the scene or if they can be omitted or integrated more effectively.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines historical context with personal narratives, creating a thought-provoking and engaging storyline.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring the impact of political decisions on individuals, as well as the theme of survival and adaptation, is well-developed and thought-provoking.

Plot: 7

The plot moves smoothly, intertwining historical events with personal stories to create a compelling narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug trade narrative by exploring the moral complexities of the characters and their actions. The authenticity of the dialogue and situations adds to the originality.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined and their actions reflect the complexities of their motivations and circumstances.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the characters' actions and decisions reflect their evolving perspectives.

Internal Goal: 8

Peña's internal goal is to take down the trafficker 'Sure Shot' and seek justice for the innocent victims caught in the crossfire of the drug war. This reflects his deeper desire for justice and redemption for his past mistakes.

External Goal: 7

Peña's external goal is to dismantle the drug trafficking network and prevent further violence and bloodshed. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in his role as a DEA agent.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict, both internal and external, driving the characters' actions and decisions.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting values, moral dilemmas, and external challenges that test the protagonist's resolve. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high for the characters, as they navigate a dangerous world filled with political intrigue and personal risks.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by providing crucial information about the characters' motivations and the historical context.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the shifting perspectives, moral conflicts, and unexpected twists in the characters' actions. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how events will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the moral ambiguity of good and bad, as seen in the comparison between Nixon, Pinochet, and the drug dealers. This challenges Peña's beliefs about justice and the nature of power.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a sense of sadness and reflection, particularly through the portrayal of the consequences of political decisions on individuals.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is informative and reflective, providing insight into the characters' thoughts and the historical context.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense dialogue, moral dilemmas, and historical context. The audience is drawn into the complex world of drug trafficking and law enforcement.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a mix of fast-paced action and introspective moments. The rhythm of the dialogue and voiceovers adds to the overall impact.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, dialogue formatting, and visual descriptions. The use of voiceovers and archival footage enhances the storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a non-linear structure, blending present-day events with archival footage to provide context and depth to the narrative. The pacing and rhythm are effective in building tension.

INT. LABORATORY - STANFORD UNIVERSITY - DAY

The rat reaches the end of the maze and hits a lever.

WIDER, to reveal a PROFESSOR instructing a STUDENT.

PROFESSOR
Make sure the retractable levers are
extended into the box.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Cocaine hijacks pleasure centers in
the brain. A rat will choose cocaine
over food and water.

PROFESSOR
Record locomotor activity after the
subject self-administers.

CLOSE - ON THE RAT

It hits the LEVER again and again.

MURPHY (V.O.)
It will choose cocaine over sleep,
over sex, over life itself.

WIDER, as the Professor walks out--

PROFESSOR
Make sure you refill the Merck
containers as needed. Let's see if
self-administration leads to
starvation.

He exits. The Student examines the vial of flaky-pink Merck
cocaine, pours some on the counter.

MURPHY (V.O.)
The human brain isn't quite the same
as a rodent's...

The Student SNORTS a line of coke.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Unless we're talking about cocaine.

EXT. BORDER - PERU/COLOMBIA - DAY

Cockroach's Renault pulls to a checkpoint. His wife sits in
the passenger seat.
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MURPHY (V.O.)
Cockroach knew he had the perfect
product. He just needed to smuggle
it to the right markets. And the
best smugglers in the world were in
Colombia.

The sign above the border patrol says: "COLOMBIA."

CUT TO:

A QUARTER HORSE, doing "dainty-steps" in a ring.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Like Goldilocks, he had three options.
And pay attention, because all three
are important to this story.

EXT. HORSE RIDING RING - MEDELLÍN - DAY

A horse show. FABIO OCHOA rides a "dainty-step" quarter
horse as its hooves blur with mincing, cartoon-like speed.

MURPHY (V.O.)
The Ochoa Brothers: Jorge, Juan David,
and that's Fabio. The typical
Colombian smuggling family: they
made a fortune from contraband.

Brothers JUAN DAVID and JORGE, wearing Polo shirts next to
their beautiful GIRLFRIENDS, applaud.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
They were smart and handsome, but
Cockroach felt the high life had
made them soft...

The horse is so steady that Fabio balances a teacup on his
head without dropping it.

CUT TO:

CLOSE - JOSE RODRIGUEZ GACHA

Steps into FRAME, wearing a sombrero and holding a carbine.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
There was Jose Rodriguez Gacha -
nicknamed "The Mexican" for his love
of tequila and sombreros. He
dominated the emerald smuggling
routes.
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Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Dark, Intense, Informative

Summary In this scene, a rat in a laboratory maze self-administers cocaine while a professor and student observe. The student eventually snorts cocaine. The scene transitions to a border checkpoint in Peru/Colombia and a horse riding ring in Medellín, introducing characters involved in smuggling. The conflict arises from the addictive properties of cocaine and the potential conflicts related to smuggling. The tone is intense and suspenseful, highlighting the dangerous world of drug smuggling.

Strengths

Innovative concept
Effective world-building
Engaging introduction of key characters

Weaknesses

Lack of emotional depth
Limited character interaction
Focus on exposition over dialogue

General Critique

The scene transitions abruptly from a laboratory setting at Stanford University to a border checkpoint in Peru/Colombia and a horse riding ring in Medellín, which may confuse the audience and disrupt the flow of the narrative.
The dialogue in the laboratory scene feels a bit heavy-handed and expository, with the professor and student discussing cocaine addiction in a very direct and unnatural way.
The visual descriptions in the scene are lacking, making it difficult for the audience to fully visualize the setting and characters.
The voiceover by Murphy is informative but could be more seamlessly integrated into the scene to enhance the storytelling.
The introduction of Cockroach and the Ochoa Brothers feels rushed and disconnected from the previous scenes, making it challenging for the audience to understand the relevance of these new characters.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider restructuring the scene to create a smoother transition between the laboratory setting and the introduction of new characters in Colombia.
Focus on creating more natural and engaging dialogue between the professor and student to convey information about cocaine addiction in a more subtle way.
Enhance the visual descriptions to paint a clearer picture of the laboratory setting, the characters, and their actions.
Integrate Murphy's voiceover more organically into the scene by using it to enhance the mood and atmosphere rather than simply providing exposition.
Provide more context for the introduction of Cockroach and the Ochoa Brothers to help the audience understand their significance in the larger narrative.

Expert Suggestions

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Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets the tone for the series by exploring the dark and intense world of drug trafficking while providing informative insights into the effects of cocaine addiction.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using a rat experiment to illustrate the addictive nature of cocaine is innovative and engaging, adding depth to the narrative.

Plot: 7

The plot introduces key characters and sets up the conflict in the story, but the focus on the rat experiment slightly detracts from the overall plot progression.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on addiction and criminal activities by intertwining scientific experiments with drug smuggling. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the setting.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The introduction of key characters like Cockroach, the Ochoa Brothers, and Jose Rodriguez Gacha adds depth to the story and sets up potential conflicts and alliances.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character development or change within the scene, as the focus is more on introducing characters and establishing the setting.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to understand the effects of cocaine on the brain and behavior, reflecting a deeper desire to uncover the complexities of human psychology and addiction.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to conduct experiments on rats with cocaine to observe their behavior and reactions, reflecting the immediate challenge of conducting scientific research and gathering data.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between different drug trafficking groups and the addictive nature of cocaine create tension and set the stage for future confrontations.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with ethical dilemmas and criminal activities posing challenges for the protagonist, creating uncertainty and conflict.

High Stakes: 7

The high stakes of the drug trade and the addictive nature of cocaine are subtly hinted at, setting up the dangerous and intense world the characters inhabit.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key players, conflicts, and themes that will drive the narrative in future episodes.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected juxtaposition of academic research and criminal activities, creating a sense of tension and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the ethical implications of conducting experiments with addictive substances on animals. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs about the boundaries of scientific research and the potential harm it may cause.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene lacks emotional depth due to its focus on exposition and setting up the narrative, rather than character development or emotional arcs.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue serves mainly as a voiceover narration to provide context and information, lacking in-depth character interactions or emotional depth.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of scientific intrigue and criminal suspense, keeping the audience hooked with its unique premise and character dynamics.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged with a well-balanced rhythm of dialogue and action.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively transitions between different locations and characters, maintaining a cohesive narrative flow.

INT. LUXURY FINCA - MEDELLÍN - NIGHT

REVERSING, to find a sophisticated cocktail party.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Emeralds were a pretty rough trade
even by Colombian standards. If you
make it to the top, it means you've
killed your enemies and...

GACHA'S PARTNER
Hey partner, what are you doing here?

Gacha and two GUNMEN mow down the party guests with their
machine guns. Smokey, horrible carnage.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Cockroach worried that the emerald
trade had made Gacha too hard...

Gacha and his men exit the party.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
So he zeroed in on his third option.
A man who Cockroach knew would be
"just right..."

TIGHT: ON PABLO ESCOBAR

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Yeah. You guessed it. Pablo Escobar.
The man who would change my life
forever.

Pablo calmly pops a Chiclet in his mouth. He's driving in
the front seat of a jeep.

CAMERA PULLING BACK

To reveal his cousin GUSTAVO, late 20s, as passenger.

CAMERA RISES HIGHER

There's a FOUR-AXLE TRUCK driving behind the jeep.

RISING STILL HIGHER - OVERHEAD SHOT

Thirty TRUCKS behind the jeep, passing through FRAME.
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MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Pablo was making a killing in the
smuggling business. Stolen goods,
cigarettes, alcohol, marijuana, you
name it. If there was a market,
Pablo would supply it.

CUT TO:

OVER THE SHOULDER: A COP

A police checkpoint. Pablo pulls to a stop. There are ten
heavily armed DAS AGENTS.

MURPHY (V.O.)
At that time, Pablo owned every
policeman in Medellín. But DAS was
Colombia's version of the FBI. They
didn't play by the same rules.

A DAS AGENT steps up to the jeep.

PABLO
Good day.

DAS AGENT
Are you Pablo Escobar?

PABLO
Yes. Where's Felipo?

DAS AGENT
He's been arrested.

DAS Agent gestures. Felipo's being dragged to an unmarked
sedan in handcuffs. He's been beaten to a pulp.

PABLO
Hey, this is bullshit, man. Felipo
works for me.

DAS AGENT
He used to work for you. Now he's
going to jail.

GUSTAVO
Do you know who you're talking to?

DAS AGENT
Shut the fuck up.
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PABLO
Please, Gustavo. Show respect. Let
Mr. Herrera speak.

DAS AGENT
How do you know my name?

PABLO
(pointing)
You're Colonel Jose Luis Herrera.
That's Nacho Ibarra. There's Garcia.
Lopez. Pinella. Esperanza.

The DAS AGENTS are stunned. How does he know their names?

HERRERA
Open the fucking trucks.

CUT TO:

A TRUCK PANEL DOOR ROLLS OPEN.

Pablo and Herrera stand by the truck. Other DAS AGENTS
inspect the contents: crates of Johnny Walker, Marlboros,
television sets and toys.

HERRERA
Who the fuck do you think you are?
You don't even bother to hide your
contraband?

PABLO
I pay for the privilege.

NACHO IBARRA peers down at Pablo from inside the truck.

IBARRA
Where are your import papers? You
need the papers for these TV sets.

PABLO
Take the television.

IBARRA
Sorry, Escobar. We're not Medellín
cops making fifty pesos a week.

PABLO
It's not for you. It's for Carlito.
Your son. Wouldn't he like a TV in
his room?
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Ibarra is shocked. But Pablo's turned his attention to
another agent on the truck.

PABLO (CONT'D)
Hey, Pinella. Your daughter just
got her driver's license, right?
Pioneer makes a nice car stereo.

He turns to yet another guy.

PABLO (CONT'D)
Lopez. Your wife is beautiful.
What's she doing with a guy like
you? I think she deserves some
jewelry. Should I get a couple of
my guys to drop it off?

The DAS Agents, at first so tough and sure of themselves,
are now soft as jello.

PABLO (CONT'D)
(calmly)
Gentlemen, let me tell you who I am.
I am Pablo Fucking Escobar. My eyes
are everywhere. You can't do a
goddamn thing in Antioquia without
me knowing about it. I'm going to
be President of Colombia one day.

The DAS Agents are transfixed.

PABLO (CONT'D)
I make deals for a living. You can
accept my deal or accept the
consequences for not taking it.

From each of the thirty truck cabs, DRIVERS emerge with tire
irons, guns, clubs. One of them we recognize as--

POISON

AR-15 assault rifle propped on his arm.

PABLO

pulls a wad of cash.

PABLO (CONT'D)
Silver or lead. Your choice. Now
why don't we negotiate a bit and we
can all leave happy. Deal?
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Over this, the sounds of merriment...

CUT TO:

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Menacing

Summary Pablo Escobar and his associates arrive at a luxury finca in Medellín, mowing down guests with machine guns. Escobar establishes himself as the new leader of the drug cartel, showcasing his ruthlessness and intelligence. He meets with police officers at a checkpoint, bribing them to allow his contraband to pass through. Escobar demonstrates his power by knowing personal details of the officers and offering bribes, ultimately successfully transporting his contraband.

Strengths

Intense dialogue
Complex characters
High-stakes conflict
Tension-filled atmosphere

Weaknesses

Limited character development
Lack of emotional depth in some interactions

General Critique

The scene opens with a violent and chaotic cocktail party where Gacha and his gunmen mow down the guests with machine guns. The imagery of the carnage is intense and graphic, which may be too explicit for some audiences.
The voiceover by Murphy provides some context and background information, but it feels a bit disconnected from the action on screen. The transition between the voiceover and the visuals could be smoother to enhance the storytelling.
The introduction of Pablo Escobar is a pivotal moment in the scene, but the buildup to his appearance could be more suspenseful and impactful. The tension leading up to his entrance could be heightened to create a more dramatic effect.
The interaction between Pablo and the DAS agents is intriguing, showcasing his power and influence. However, some of the dialogue feels a bit forced and could be more subtly written to convey Pablo's authority without being overly explicit.
The scene effectively sets up the dynamic between Pablo Escobar and the authorities, as well as his approach to negotiation and control. However, there could be more nuance in the portrayal of Pablo's character to add depth and complexity.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider toning down the graphic violence in the cocktail party scene to make it more palatable for a wider audience.
Work on integrating the voiceover narration more seamlessly with the visuals to enhance the storytelling flow.
Enhance the buildup to Pablo Escobar's entrance to create a more suspenseful and impactful moment.
Refine the dialogue between Pablo and the DAS agents to make it more subtle and nuanced, while still conveying his power and influence.
Add more layers to Pablo's character to make him a more complex and compelling figure in the scene.

Expert Suggestions

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Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, and effectively sets up the conflict and power dynamics that will drive the narrative forward. The dialogue is sharp and impactful, showcasing the complex relationships between the characters.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of showcasing Pablo Escobar's control over law enforcement and his ruthless tactics in the drug trade is compelling and sets the stage for the larger story arc. The scene effectively establishes the central conflict and power struggles that will drive the plot.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene through the introduction of key characters, the establishment of power dynamics, and the escalation of tension. The scene sets up future conflicts and developments that will drive the narrative forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on the criminal underworld, focusing on the protagonist's manipulation of power dynamics and moral ambiguity. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.

Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their personalities shine through in their interactions. Pablo Escobar is portrayed as a cunning and manipulative figure, while the DAS agents are shown to be both intimidated and conflicted in their dealings with him.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the interactions between Pablo Escobar and the DAS agents reveal the shifting power dynamics and the impact of fear and intimidation on their decisions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to navigate the dangerous world of crime and establish his power and influence. This reflects his deeper desire for control and respect in a ruthless environment.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to assert his dominance and negotiate with the DAS agents to avoid consequences for his illegal activities. This reflects the immediate challenge of maintaining his criminal empire and avoiding law enforcement.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and multi-layered, involving power struggles, intimidation tactics, and high-stakes negotiations. The tension between Pablo Escobar and the DAS agents drives the scene forward and sets up future confrontations.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the DAS agents posing a significant threat to the protagonist's criminal activities. The audience is kept in suspense about the outcome of the negotiation.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are high, with the characters facing life-threatening situations, power struggles, and moral dilemmas. The consequences of their actions have far-reaching implications, adding to the tension and suspense of the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing key characters, establishing power dynamics, and setting up future conflicts and developments. It lays the groundwork for the larger narrative arc and builds anticipation for what is to come.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the negotiation between the protagonist and the DAS agents. The shifting power dynamics and moral ambiguity add to the unpredictability.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict is evident in the protagonist's manipulation of power dynamics and moral ambiguity. It challenges traditional values of law and order, highlighting the protagonist's willingness to use any means necessary to achieve his goals.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, including tension, fear, and intrigue. The power dynamics and manipulation tactics used by Pablo Escobar create a sense of unease and uncertainty, drawing the audience into the high-stakes world of the drug trade.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is sharp, impactful, and reveals the power dynamics and manipulation at play in the scene. Pablo Escobar's dialogue is particularly effective in showcasing his control and intimidation tactics.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense action, suspenseful dialogue, and high stakes. The conflict between the protagonist and the DAS agents keeps the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a gradual build-up of tension leading to a climactic confrontation. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences contributes to the scene's effectiveness.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, with well-defined action and dialogue sequences. It follows the expected format for a crime drama genre.

Structure: 9

The structure of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to a climactic confrontation between the protagonist and the DAS agents. It follows the expected format for a crime drama genre.

INT. BAR - MEDELLÍN - NIGHT

Pablo and Gustavo are drinking beer in a raucous bar filled
with pretty girls. They're drunk and happy.

PABLO
It's an interesting proposal.

REVERSING, we see Cockroach. His leather bag rests on the
table with the KILO OF COKE clearly visible.

COCKROACH
If you're with me, I can take you to
Peru. Show you where I buy the paste.
You smuggle it here, I teach you how
to turn it into powder. Then we
sell it all over Colombia.

GUSTAVO
How much does it cost?

COCKROACH
In Chile, we sold it for ten dollars
a gram.

PABLO
You sell it by the gram?

Cockroach dumps a line onto the table.

COCKROACH
This much keeps a person flying for
twenty minutes. When the effect
wears off, you want more.

He sniffs the line with a rolled-up bill. Pablo and Gustavo
share a glance.

GUSTAVO
(to Pablo)
If this shit is so good, we could
find room on our trucks.

COCKROACH
We move it to all the major cities:
Bogota, Cartegna, Baranquilla. We'll
make a fortune.
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PABLO
You think small, my friend.
(then)
If it costs ten dollars a gram here,
how much do you think it will cost
in Miami?

CUT TO:

EXT. SOUTH BEACH - MIAMI - DAY

A wide expanse of white sand beach and pearl blue ocean.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Back then, Miami was a paradise.
I'd signed up for the sand, surf and
women.

A chyron appears:

"Miami, 1979."

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
In `79, the bad guys I was chasing
wore flip-flops--

CLOSE: ON FLIP-FLOPS

Slapping across the pavement. TILT UP to reveal TWO SURFERS
(one with a backpack) racing PAST CAMERA.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
I was a young DEA agent, partnered
with my buddy Kevin Samms.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Stop, DEA!

Murphy sprints past CAMERA.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Kevin had a few pounds to lose.

NEW ANGLE: KEVIN SAMMS

Overweight, huffing for breath.

WIDER

Murphy (younger) and Kevin, 20s, chase the Surfers down on
the promenade. One of the Surfers trips over his flip-flops,
smashes to the ground.
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The other Surfer tumbles over the prone body of his friend.

CLOSE - ON MURPHY

Gun out, ultra-serious, pouncing on the Surfers.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Face down. Gimme hands!

Murphy cuffs the Surfer. Kevin arrives, huffing.

KEVIN
He told you to stop, you sonsabitches!

He grabs the backpack off the ground.

MURPHY
What do we got?

Kevin opens the backpack and extracts a large pillow of
MARIJUANA wrapped in plastic.

KEVIN
We got ourselves a promotion, my
man. Let's celebrate.

CUT TO:

Genres: Crime, Drama
Tone: Dark, Intense, Suspenseful

Summary In Medellín, Pablo and Gustavo meet Cockroach, who proposes a lucrative cocaine deal involving smuggling from Peru and selling in Colombia and Miami. Meanwhile, in a flashback to Miami in 1979, DEA agents Murphy and Kevin Samms arrest surfers with marijuana, foreshadowing the future drug trade.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Strong character introduction
Tension building

Weaknesses

Lack of character development
Limited emotional depth

General Critique

The scene lacks depth and complexity compared to the previous scenes which had intense conflicts and moral dilemmas.
The dialogue feels a bit on the nose and lacks subtlety in conveying the characters' motivations and intentions.
The transition from the intense shootout in the previous scene to a casual conversation in a bar feels abrupt and disjointed.
The scene could benefit from more visual cues and actions to enhance the storytelling and engage the audience.
The introduction of Cockroach and his proposal could be more nuanced and intriguing to create suspense and tension.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding layers to the conversation between Pablo, Gustavo, and Cockroach to reflect the complexity of their characters and the dangerous world they inhabit.
Introduce subtle conflicts or foreshadowing elements to build anticipation and keep the audience engaged.
Enhance the visual elements in the bar scene to create a more immersive and dynamic atmosphere.
Explore different ways to convey the characters' intentions and emotions through actions and reactions rather than direct dialogue.
Consider revisiting the pacing and tone of the scene to ensure it aligns with the overall narrative arc and themes of the screenplay.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the criminal underworld and the characters' motivations, creating tension and intrigue.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of drug smuggling and the allure of easy money is well-established, setting the stage for future conflicts and developments.

Plot: 7

The plot advances as the characters discuss a new drug smuggling venture, hinting at future conflicts and challenges.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh approach to the familiar theme of drug trafficking, with unique character dynamics and realistic dialogue. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.

Character Development

Characters: 9

Pablo Escobar and Gustavo are introduced as complex and ambitious characters, laying the foundation for their roles in the story.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it sets the stage for potential transformations in the future.

Internal Goal: 8

Pablo's internal goal is to expand his drug empire and increase his wealth and power. This reflects his desire for control and dominance in the criminal world.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to establish a drug smuggling operation from Peru to Colombia and eventually to Miami. This reflects the immediate challenge of expanding his criminal enterprise and maximizing profits.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the characters' desire for wealth and the risks involved in drug smuggling is evident, adding tension to the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing moral dilemmas and conflicting goals that create tension and conflict. The audience is left wondering how the characters will navigate these challenges.

High Stakes: 8

The high stakes of drug smuggling and the potential consequences for the characters add intensity to the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing key characters and setting up a major plot point.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the characters' plans and the moral dilemmas they face. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the morality of drug trafficking and the consequences of getting involved in such illegal activities. It challenges the protagonist's values and beliefs about power, wealth, and the impact of his actions on society.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of unease and anticipation, setting the stage for future emotional developments.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is engaging and reveals the characters' personalities and motivations effectively.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced dialogue, tense atmosphere, and high stakes. The audience is drawn into the characters' world and their dangerous plans.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is fast and intense, with quick dialogue exchanges and action sequences that keep the audience engaged. The rhythm of the scene contributes to its effectiveness in building tension and suspense.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is well-executed, with clear transitions between locations and effective use of visual cues to enhance the storytelling.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions that drive the plot forward.

INT. BAR - MIAMI - NIGHT

Thumping music, filled with partyers. Kevin sits with other
DEA GUYS, celebrating their bust. In the background, Murphy
is getting another pitcher at the bar.

DEA #1
Who do we pick?

DEA #2
How about her?

DEA #2 points to a BLONDE GIRL at another table.

KEVIN
No, no. Let's fuck him up.

DEA GUY #1
Let's mess with his head.

KEVIN
Yeah, let's go for her.

THEIR P.O.V. - CONNIE
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Connie - seen at the top of the script - sits at the bar
with a FRIEND.

DEA #1 (O.S.)
She's hot.

MURPHY

returns with a cold pitcher of beer. Unaware that he's about
to be the subject of a prank.

KEVIN
Hey, Murph, Sparrow 3 o'clock,
checking you out.

Kevin chin nods to Connie. Murphy steals a glance.

DEA #1
You were walking back from the bar,
she was checking out your ass.

MURPHY
Get the fuck outta here.

KEVIN
She wasn't checking out your ass,
but she eye-fucked you all the way
back to the table. I'm not kidding,
man. For real.

MURPHY
The tan one?

KEVIN
She had eyes on you, man.

The DEA GUYS egg him on: Go for it/C'mon, Pussy/Man up!

MURPHY
You serious?

KEVIN
If I'm lying, I'm dying.

MURPHY
(a beat)
Fuck it. I'm going in...

DEA GUYS
Murph's flying in/Get another pitcher
while you're up there.
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AT THE BAR - CONNIE AND HER PRETTY FRIEND

They're watching the Miami/Florida State game on the
television. Murphy approaches with a smile.

MURPHY
Hey, how are you?

CONNIE
(barely a glance)
Busy.

He looks back at his table.

HIS P.O.V. - THE DEA GUYS

They're busting a gut laughing. Gotcha sucker!

MURPHY

starts back toward his table.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Those bastards got me. But I couldn't
let it end like that.

He turns and goes back to Connie and her friend.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Listen. I'm sorry. See those guys
over there? They're fucking with
me. They said you were checking out
my ass. Who checks out a cop's ass?

CONNIE
You're a cop? Strike two.

MURPHY
Not a cop, actually. I'm D-E-A.

CONNIE
A narc. Strike three.

Connie's Pretty Friend chimes in--

PRETTY FRIEND
Drug Enforcement? So you're the one
making pot more expensive.

MURPHY
(lightly)
It's against the law, ma'am.
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CONNIE
(laughing)
Be careful. He'll arrest you.

MURPHY
Help me out here. I wanna show those
assholes up. C'mon. Give me your
phone number.

CONNIE
How about a fake phone number?

MURPHY
That'll work.

Connie digs a pen and a scrap of paper from her purse. She
scrawls "Connie" and a phone number.

MURPHY (CONT'D)
Sorry for the bother.

AT THE TABLE

Murphy returns, flapping the scrap of paper.

MURPHY
Read it and weep, assholes.

The DEA Guys are suitably impressed.

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - MIAMI - NIGHT

Murphy sits on his bed in a messy bachelor apartment. He
stares at the scrap of paper.

MURPHY (V.O.)
I figured what the hell. Worst that
could happen was I'd wake up some
grandmother in Boca.

He dials the number.

INTERCUT WITH:

INT. ANOTHER APARTMENT - MIAMI - NIGHT

Someone grabs the ringing phone off the receiver.

CONNIE
Hello?
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MURPHY (O.S.)
So it wasn't a fake.

CONNIE
Thought you might figure it out.
After all, you're D-E-A.

Murphy smiles.

MURPHY (V.O.)
And just like that, she had me.

CUT TO:

PABLO ESCOBAR

eyes shining.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The minute Pablo laid his eyes on
the paste-processing lab in Peru,
cocaine had him.

Genres: Crime, Drama
Tone: Humorous, Light-hearted, Sarcastic

Summary DEA colleagues prank Murphy by sending him after a woman who's not interested. Murphy, determined to prove them wrong, gets her phone number, only to find out later that it's real.

Strengths

Humorous dialogue
Character development
Engaging interaction

Weaknesses

Lack of significant plot progression

General Critique

The scene lacks depth and substance, focusing too much on a cliched prank played on Murphy at a bar.
The dialogue feels forced and lacks authenticity, especially in the interactions between the DEA guys and Murphy.
The character of Connie is one-dimensional and stereotypical, serving only as a prop in the prank played on Murphy.
The scene fails to advance the plot or develop the characters in a meaningful way, making it feel disconnected from the rest of the script.
There is a missed opportunity to explore deeper themes or conflicts related to the drug trade and the characters' motivations.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider rewriting the scene to add more depth and meaning, focusing on character development and advancing the plot.
Explore the relationships between the characters in a more nuanced way, avoiding cliches and stereotypes.
Introduce conflicts or themes related to the main storyline to make the scene more relevant and engaging.
Improve the dialogue to make it more authentic and reflective of the characters' personalities and motivations.
Ensure that every scene serves a purpose in the overall narrative and contributes to the development of the story and characters.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively balances humor with character development, providing a refreshing break from the intense drug enforcement storyline.

Story Content

Concept: 7

The concept of a DEA agent being pranked by his colleagues and then using the opportunity to connect with a woman at a bar is unique and adds depth to the character of Murphy.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around a light-hearted prank and Murphy's attempt to turn the situation around, adding a layer of character development.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on the typical 'prank at a bar' scenario by incorporating elements of law enforcement and personal relationships. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The scene focuses on Murphy's character, showcasing his ability to think on his feet and connect with others in unexpected situations.

Character Changes: 5

Murphy's character undergoes a minor change as he decides to take control of the situation and engage with the women at the bar.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist, Murphy, wants to prove himself and show up his colleagues by successfully approaching a woman at the bar. This reflects his desire for validation and acceptance within his group.

External Goal: 7.5

Murphy's external goal is to prank his colleague and approach the woman at the bar to get her phone number. This reflects the immediate challenge of peer pressure and the desire to impress his friends.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 3

The conflict in the scene is minimal, focusing more on humor and character interaction.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene, in the form of peer pressure and Murphy's internal conflict, adds tension and uncertainty to the narrative.

High Stakes: 2

The stakes in the scene are low, focusing more on character development and humor.

Story Forward: 5

While the scene does not significantly move the main plot forward, it adds depth to Murphy's character and provides a brief respite from the intense storyline.

Unpredictability: 7.5

This scene is unpredictable because the outcome of Murphy's prank and his interaction with Connie are not immediately clear.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Murphy's role as a DEA agent and his personal desires for connection and validation. It challenges his beliefs about law enforcement and personal relationships.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a positive and amused emotional response from the audience, providing a light-hearted moment in the narrative.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty and engaging, capturing the banter between the DEA agents and the interaction between Murphy and the women at the bar.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic interactions between the characters, the humor, and the suspense of Murphy's prank.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue and action to keep the audience engaged.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with proper scene headings and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a bar scene in a crime drama, with clear character motivations and interactions.

EXT. JUNGLE PROCESSING LAB - PERU - DAY

Thickly forested. A half dozen WORKERS (men and children)
trample coca leaves in a large plastic-lined VAT filled with
water and bleach.

COCKROACH, PABLO AND GUSTAVO

are shown around by the LAB MANAGER. He gestures to another
large VAT being filled with KEROSENE.

LAB MANAGER
The kerosene separates the drug from
the leaf.

A worker scoops a PLASTIC BUCKET of the brownish kerosene
mixture and adds Ammonium from a bottle. The liquid in the
bucket blooms WHITE like cream in coffee.

GUSTAVO
Look at that.

LAB MANAGER
Ammonium is added to make the paste.

CLOSE - ON THE BUCKET

Now containing a gummy, yellowish solid. The solid is dumped
onto a bed sheet.
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WIDER, as a WORKER squeezes the bed sheet to remove the excess
kerosene, leaving a one-kilo chunk of paste.

GUSTAVO
We'll take a kilo.

LAB MANAGER
A whole kilo. Great.

PABLO
No.

LAB MANAGER
(to Cockroach)
You said one kilo.

PABLO
We'll take five.

COCKROACH
How do we get five across the border?

PABLO
Gustavo will figure it out. Always
does.

CUT TO:

EXT. RENAULT CAR LOT - PERU - DAY

Gustavo shows Pablo and Cockroach a yellow Renault 4S.

GUSTAVO
Check the wheel-well. It's huge.

A CAR SALESMAN approaches them.

CAR SALESMAN
It's a great choice. 22.5 horsepower.
More than the Citroen 2CV. It's
comfortable and the gasoline
consumption --

PABLO
(to Salesman)
Is it easy to remove the wheel?

The Salesman never heard that one.

CAR SALESMAN
What?
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GUSTAVO
(to Pablo)
We only have to do it once. Trust
me - I can fit 5K in there.

PABLO
Ok. I will take it. Three cars,
please.

The Salesman can’t believe his ears.

SALESMAN
Did you say three?

GUSTAVO
(to Cockroach)
I guess we're going back to the lab...

COCKROACH
Why?

GUSTAVO
(to Cockroach)
Five kilos per wheel-well, equals
twenty kilos per car. Three cars,
sixty kilos.

Pablo claps Cockroach on the back.

PABLO
At nine dollars profit per gram...

EXT. PERUVIAN MOUNTAIN ROAD - AERIAL VIEW - SUNRISE

The beautiful panorama of the lush Peruvian mountains.

MURPHY (V.O.)
That's five hundred thousand dollars
per trip - using the same smuggling
routes he always used.

A paved road cuts a ribbon through the dense foliage. THREE
RENAULT R4S appear from FRAME LEFT, snaking through the pass.

LOW ANGLE

Pablo drives the one up front.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Easiest money he ever made.

CUT TO:
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INT. COCAINE KITCHEN - BELEN, COLOMBIA - NIGHT

A cramped kitchen with three COOKS in smocks. Cockroach
teaches Pablo and Gustavo the next part of the process.

COCKROACH
The hydrochloric acid turns the base
into crystal.

GUSTAVO
It smells in here.

COCKROACH
That's the acetone.

Cockroach presses a button. A DOZEN LAMPS light up on top
of the damp cocaine crystals.

PABLO
And what’s with all those lights?

COCKROACH
Drying.

EXT. COCAINE KITCHEN - BELEN, COLOMBIA - NIGHT

Light floods from the windows, illuminating the house like a
Christmas tree. Pablo and Gustavo watch PAINTERS close the
windows and start to apply a black coat of paint to the glass.
Sulfurous smoke pours from the window cracks.

GUSTAVO
Isn't this going to suffocate the
workers?

PABLO
Let’s build a chimney.

CUT TO:

A WOMAN'S HANDS, with a sewing needle.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Like her son, Pablo's mother Hermilda
was very resourceful.

INT. HERMILDA'S HOUSE - MEDELLÍN - NIGHT

HERMILDA ESCOBAR, 50s, places down the needle and holds up
what she's been sewing.

A JACKET
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Lined with secret compartments.

PABLO
Mama, I love it. How much do you
think I can fit in there?

Hermilda inspects the jacket.

MURPHY (V.O.)
In Colombia, even the women have a
tradition of smuggling.

HERMILDA
I guess about 5 kilos. Just make
sure someone else is wearing it.

CUT TO:

THE LION, a regal Colombian with a healthy mane of hair.

MURPHY (V.O.)
That someone would be "The Lion," a
friend of Pablo's who'd spent his
childhood in the United States.

INT. EL DORADO INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - BOGOTA - DAY

WIDENING, as the Lion (wearing Hermilda's jacket) walks toward
a line that reads "Customs." Lion easily passes through the
customs line.

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Dark, Intense, Suspenseful, Mysterious

Summary Pablo, Gustavo, and Cockroach visit a jungle processing lab in Peru to observe the making of cocaine paste. They decide to smuggle 5 kilos of cocaine across the border in Renault cars. They also learn about turning the cocaine base into crystals. Pablo's mother shows him a jacket with secret compartments for smuggling. The Lion agrees to wear the jacket to pass through customs at El Dorado International Airport.

Strengths

Detailed depiction of drug production process
Strategic smuggling methods
High-stakes tension

Weaknesses

Lack of emotional depth in characters
Dialogue could be more engaging

General Critique

The scene effectively showcases the process of making cocaine paste in a jungle processing lab in Peru, providing insight into the intricate steps involved in drug production.
The dialogue between the characters, especially Pablo, Gustavo, and Cockroach, adds depth to their personalities and motivations, highlighting their roles in the drug smuggling operation.
The visual descriptions of the cocaine production process, from trampling coca leaves to adding kerosene and ammonium, create a vivid and immersive setting for the scene.
The introduction of the Renault cars as a smuggling method and the calculation of profits per trip add a layer of detail to the operation, emphasizing the business aspect of drug trafficking.
The transition to the cocaine kitchen in Colombia and the involvement of Pablo's mother, Hermilda, in creating a jacket with secret compartments for smuggling, adds a familial and resourceful element to the scene.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding more tension or conflict to the scene to heighten the stakes and engage the audience further.
Explore the emotional impact of the characters' involvement in the drug trade, delving deeper into their moral dilemmas and motivations.
Enhance the visual storytelling by incorporating more sensory details to immerse the audience in the environment of the processing lab and cocaine kitchen.
Develop the relationships between the characters, particularly Pablo, Gustavo, and Cockroach, to create more dynamic interactions and character arcs.
Consider exploring the consequences of the characters' actions in the scene, setting up potential conflicts or challenges for future developments in the story.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively portrays the intricate process of cocaine production, introduces high-stakes smuggling methods, and sets a dark and intense tone that keeps the audience engaged.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of showcasing the step-by-step process of cocaine production and smuggling is well-executed, providing insight into the criminal underworld.

Plot: 7

The plot focuses on the strategic planning and execution of a drug smuggling operation, adding depth to the overall narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh approach to depicting the drug trade, focusing on the logistical challenges and risks involved in transporting drugs. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.

Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters of Pablo, Gustavo, and Cockroach are introduced with distinct personalities and roles in the drug trade.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character development in this scene, as the focus is more on the operation and logistics of drug smuggling.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to prove his capability and resourcefulness in the criminal world. This reflects his desire for power and respect within the criminal organization.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully transport a large quantity of drugs across the border. This reflects the immediate challenge of logistics and risk involved in the drug trade.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict arises from the risks involved in the drug trade, the challenges of smuggling large quantities of cocaine, and the strategic decisions made by the characters.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with logistical challenges and moral dilemmas creating obstacles for the characters to overcome.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes are evident in the risks involved in drug production and smuggling, as well as the potential profits and consequences of getting caught.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by showcasing the planning and execution of a major drug smuggling operation.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces unexpected challenges and decisions for the characters, keeping the audience on edge about the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict is between the protagonist's willingness to take risks and break the law for profit, and the ethical implications of engaging in illegal activities and harming others.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene lacks emotional depth but creates tension and suspense through the depiction of criminal activities.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue serves the purpose of explaining the drug production process and planning the smuggling operation, but could be more dynamic and engaging.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it presents a high-stakes situation with clear goals and obstacles, keeping the audience invested in the characters' actions and decisions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the characters' actions.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings and descriptions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively building tension and conflict through dialogue and action.

INT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

Lion emerges from the arrival gate, behind someone in a
Dolphins jersey. He looks around.

A VOICE (O.S.)
Yo man, what's up?!

Lion grins.

REVERSING, to find CARLOS LEHDER, 30s, a deep tan, a "John
Lennon" t-shirt, and a swastika tattooed on his arm.

MURPHY (V.O.)
And that's Carlos Lehder. Half
Colombian, half German, one hundred
percent playboy. Big fan of John
Lennon and Adolf Hitler. Go figure.

The two men hug. Lehder eyes Lion.
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LEHDER
It's hot man. Why the fuck are you
wearing a jacket?

MURPHY (V.O.)
Back in '79 Lehder was flying bales
of grass up from Colombia on a fleet
of small planes.

INT. CAR - LONG TERM PARKING LOT - DAY

Lehder sits behind the wheel of a boat Cadillac. Lion pulls
a bag of COCAINE from inside his "secret" jacket.

LION
It's the perfect product.

LEHDER
I did a bit in jail, remember? I
saw this stuff. It's poison.

LION
Pablo thinks the gringos will love
it.

LEHDER
It will fuck their brains up - that’s
for sure.

The Lion opens the car door and steps outside.

LEHDER (CONT'D)
Where are you going?

Lion shows Lehder a plane ticket.

LION
Back home. Pick me up tomorrow.

EXT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

A PLANE takes off.

MURPHY (V.O.)
The Lion made more than twenty flights
between Medellín and Miami - drugs
in, cash out. And the rich and famous
in Miami snorted every single gram
of it. In no time, Pablo had to
replace his cars with trucks...
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EXT. PERUVIAN MOUNTAIN ROAD - AERIAL VIEW - SUNRISE

A paved road cuts a ribbon through the forest.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Gustavo had the trucks filled to the
brim with potatoes, the major item
Colombia imported from Peru. Didn't
even have to bribe the cops.

Several TRUCKS filled to the brim with potatoes appear from
FRAME LEFT, snaking their way through the pass.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The coke paste was hidden in the
spare tires. Each tire could fit
about 20 kilos. Ten trucks, twenty
kilos each, going back and forth
everyday. You do the math. It's
more money than you can imagine. No
way the Lion could transport it all.

LOW ANGLE

One of the trucks passes by Colombian customs, a spare tire
attached to it.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Pretty soon, the Lion had to come up
with new ways to smuggle the drug to
Miami.

INT. COCAINE KITCHEN - BELEN, COLOMBIA - DAY

The Lion teaches several YOUNG WOMEN how to eat condoms filled
up with cocaine. Three of them are pregnant.

LION
Wait a second - we got a problem
here. You three, step this way.

The three PREGNANT WOMEN step to the right. They're
disappointed they can't share in this bonanza.

LION (CONT'D)
U.S. Customs doesn't search pregnant
women. I think you can swallow sixty
pellets instead of fifty.

The women nod.
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INT. COCAINE KITCHEN - BELEN, COLOMBIA - LATER

The Lion teaches a COMMERCIAL PILOT and a STEWARD how to
hide cocaine in their luggage.

MURPHY (V.O.)
During the early 80s most AVIANCA
flights out of Bogota had several
mules on them - they didn't even
know about each other.

INT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

COMMERCIAL AIRPLANE PILOTS, YOUNG WOMEN and STEWARDS walk
right through the U.S. CUSTOMS.

MURPHY (V.O.)
And you know what? Getting in was
easy, because nobody was worried
about cocaine in America. All we
cared about was grass.

Everyone walks right in.

MONTAGE: VARIOUS LOCATIONS (PER PRODUCTION)

FISHERMEN put COCAINE bags inside fish and take to the sea.
COCAINE bags are inserted into OLIVE OIL cans and coffee
packages.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Pretty soon cocaine was hidden in
almost every legit Colombian export.
Fish, coffee, olive oil, rubber
hoses... You name it. But even that
didn't do it. The real game-changer
was filling Lehder's planes with
coke instead of weed.

EXT. MEDELLÍN INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

Pablo and Gustavo negotiate with Carlos Lehder in front of a
KING AIR airplane.

GUSTAVO
How much weight can you carry?

LEHDER
Where to?

GUSTAVO
Miami.
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LEHDER
About a thousand kilos, including
the fuel.

GUSTAVO
What if we take out all the seats,
and leave room just for the pilot?

Lehder stares at Gustavo, puzzled.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Six months after meeting with
Cockroach, Pablo was establishing
the first dedicated Narco route from
Colombia to America.

AERIAL SHOT - a KING AIR plane flies really low over the
ocean, approaching the Bahamas. (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
A real milestone in the story of
narcotics.

INSIDE THE PLANE - Lehder flies the plane. Behind him,
several loads of coke.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Then Pablo closed the kitchen and
started opening cocaine labs in the
middle of the jungle -

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Dark, Intense, Suspenseful

Summary Lion and Lehder discuss cocaine smuggling methods at the airport. They involve pregnant women, a pilot, and a steward to hide cocaine in various items like fish, olive oil cans, and coffee, establishing the initial Narco route from Colombia to America.

Strengths

Detailed portrayal of drug smuggling operations
Complex and compelling characters
Intense and suspenseful tone

Weaknesses

Limited focus on character development
Lack of emotional depth in certain scenes

General Critique

The scene transitions abruptly from Lion meeting Carlos Lehder at the Miami International Airport to a montage of various smuggling methods without a clear connection or transition.
The dialogue between Lehder and Lion feels a bit forced and lacks depth, especially considering the weight of the topic being discussed.
The scene lacks visual descriptions and details, making it difficult for the audience to fully immerse themselves in the setting and actions taking place.
The use of voiceover narration by Murphy is informative but can be overwhelming and disrupt the flow of the scene.
The scene jumps between different locations and characters without a clear throughline, making it feel disjointed and confusing.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding more visual descriptions to enhance the setting and actions in the scene.
Work on developing the dialogue between Lehder and Lion to make it more engaging and reflective of their characters.
Try to find a smoother transition between the meeting at the airport and the montage of smuggling methods to maintain coherence.
Limit the use of voiceover narration to key moments and focus on showing rather than telling the audience.
Ensure a clear throughline in the scene by connecting the different locations and characters in a more cohesive manner.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, offering a deep dive into the criminal underworld of drug trafficking with intense and suspenseful moments that keep the audience on edge.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of cocaine smuggling and the elaborate methods employed to transport drugs across borders is well-executed, providing a detailed look at the operations of the drug cartel.

Plot: 8

The plot is intricate and well-developed, focusing on the evolution of drug smuggling operations and the challenges faced by the characters in maintaining their criminal empire.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug smuggling operations of the 1980s, with unique methods of transporting cocaine and complex character interactions. The authenticity of the dialogue and actions adds to the originality of the scene.

Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are complex and compelling, with each playing a crucial role in the drug trafficking network. Their motivations, relationships, and actions drive the narrative forward.

Character Changes: 7

While there are subtle shifts in the characters' motivations and relationships, the scene primarily focuses on showcasing their roles within the drug cartel and the challenges they face in maintaining their criminal enterprise.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to successfully transport cocaine from Colombia to Miami and expand his drug smuggling operation. This reflects his desire for power, wealth, and influence in the criminal underworld.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to establish a successful narco route from Colombia to America and increase the amount of cocaine transported. This reflects his ambition to dominate the drug trade and outsmart law enforcement.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The scene is filled with conflict, both internal and external, as the characters navigate the dangerous world of drug trafficking and face constant threats to their operations.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with law enforcement, rival drug cartels, and moral dilemmas posing significant challenges for the protagonist. The audience is kept guessing about the outcome of his risky endeavors.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are incredibly high in the scene, with the characters involved in dangerous and illegal activities that could have severe consequences if they are caught by law enforcement or rival cartels.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing key elements of the drug smuggling operation, highlighting the evolution of the characters' roles and the escalating risks they face.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the protagonist's plans, the risky smuggling methods, and the constant threat of law enforcement. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the morality of drug trafficking and the consequences of the protagonist's actions. It challenges the protagonist's values and beliefs as he navigates the dangerous world of narcotics.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension and suspense to moral dilemmas and the consequences of criminal actions, creating a compelling and immersive experience for the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp and realistic, capturing the tense and high-pressure situations faced by the characters involved in the drug trade.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced action, suspenseful moments, and intriguing character dynamics. The high stakes and moral dilemmas keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action sequences, dialogue exchanges, and narrative exposition. It maintains a sense of urgency and tension throughout.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions. It is easy to follow and visually engaging.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions between locations and a coherent progression of events. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.

EXT. DEEP JUNGLE LAB - COLOMBIA - DAY

A tented jungle lab with white-smocked WORKERS. Ten times
bigger than the one Cockroach managed in Chile.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Under the canopy cover of the
Colombian rainforest, he could expand
his production capacity indefinitely
without anyone noticing it.

Cockroach trains the workers in the arts and sciences of
cocaine production - he's sweating, mosquitoes all over his
face as a CESSNA AIRPLANE lands in an airstrip next to the
lab - Gustavo and Pablo step outside - followed by two
beautiful HOOKERS.

Cockroach approaches them.

GUSTAVO
Hello, Moreno.
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PABLO
(re: hookers)
We brought you a gift. Brazilians -
best asses in the world.

Cockroach eyes the women.

COCKROACH
How come you guys are flying about
in planes and I am stuck here in the
fucking jungle - living in a fucking
shack - among fucking mosquitoes and
cobras?

Gustavo notices the shacks where the workers live.

GUSTAVO
You are right, Moreno. I’m sorry.

PABLO
From now on I'll build a big air-
conditioned house in all my labs -
just for you.

Cockroach looks at Pablo, pissed.

COCKROACH
Those are my labs, Pablo. My labs.

GUSTAVO
Of course they are, partner.
(tapping Cockroach)
Now show us what you got.

INT. HACIENDA NAPOLES - ANTIOQUIA - NIGHT

It's a huge party. UNIFORMED WAITERS walk around with food
and beverages. BEAUTIFUL WOMEN everywhere. Cockroach is
alone in a corner - drinking by himself.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Pablo couldn't hide his success from
his friends. They were violent,
crazy and filthy rich. Guys used to
getting what they want, one way or
another.

Pablo, Gustavo, Gacha and Jorge Ochoa are drinking at a table.

GACHA
I heard the potato business is very
profitable these days.
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Gacha picks up a French fry.

GACHA (CONT'D)
Who would think you could make so
much money off this? I am asking
myself if I should invest in it.
What do you think, Pablo?

JORGE OCHOA
I took a good look at the market.
Importing potatoes from Peru is easy.
Old smuggling routes.

GUSTAVO
If everyone starts buying potatoes
at one time, the Peruvians will raise
the price. Our margins will go down.

GACHA
They also grow potatoes in Bolivia.
We can reduce the cost of the refining
process if we buy together.

GUSTAVO
The hard part is getting the
merchandise to Miami. You need a
lot of creativity for that.

GACHA
How much would you charge to help us
be creative?

PABLO
You deliver the product to me,
labeled. I take it to Miami, and
deliver to your contact there. I
charge 35% of the sales value. But
I insure the safety of your load up
to 50% of the value.
(then)
Deal?

JORGE OCHOA
Deal.

GACHA
I will create my own routes and stop
using your services as soon as
possible. That okay with you?

Pablo stares at Gacha.
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GUSTAVO
We expect nothing less.

Gacha extends his glass for a toast--

GACHA
Partners?

For a beat, no one moves.

PABLO
We know your policy toward partners.
Let's just call us... "friendly
associates."

The men laugh and toast.

GACHA
To Miami...

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EXT. PORT OF MIAMI - DAY

Colorful cargo crates line the port. Shipments of everything
from everywhere in the world.

MURPHY (V.O.)
When I started, a one-kilo grass
bust was cause for celebration.

INT. CARGO CONTAINER - DAY

Kevin holds up a crate of ORCHIDS with a false bottom. There
are KILOS packed beneath the flowers.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Before long, we were seizing sixty
kilos of coke a day.

EXT. CARGO SHIP - DECK - DAY

SIXTY KILOS of cocaine are removed from the ship on a dolly,
along with the handcuffed Crew.

MURPHY (V.O.)
We thought we were making a huge
difference.

Murphy and the agents clear FRAME as we--

CUT TO:
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A SCUBA DIVER

drops into the water beside a CARGO BOAT.

EXT. PORT OF MIAMI - LATER

UNDERWATER

The Diver swims to the hull of the boat, where four metal
pipes are magnetically attached.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Truth is, we weren't even making a
dent...

CUT TO:

THE METAL PIPES - ON THE DOCK

Now unsealed at one end. A WORKER dumps a HUNDRED KILOS
from the pipe onto the ground.

CLOSE - ON CARLOS LEHDER, smiling...

MURPHY (V.O.)
They let us have sixty, so they could
bring in six hundred.

CUT TO:

A WHITE LAB RAT

scurrying at a frantic pace past CAMERA.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Pablo's coke flooded in.

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Businesslike

Summary Cockroach trains workers in a jungle lab, Pablo arrives with hookers and offers to improve living conditions, and at a party Pablo negotiates a deal with Gacha and Jorge Ochoa regarding smuggling cocaine to Miami.

Strengths

Detailed portrayal of drug trade operations
Strong character development
Tense and suspenseful atmosphere

Weaknesses

Limited emotional depth
Focus on business aspects may alienate some viewers

General Critique

The scene lacks a clear conflict or tension, which can make it feel stagnant and less engaging for the audience.
The dialogue feels a bit on the nose and lacks subtlety, especially in the interactions between the characters.
The transition between the jungle lab and the party at Hacienda Napoles feels abrupt and disjointed.
The character dynamics between Cockroach, Pablo, and Gustavo could be further developed to add depth and complexity to their relationships.
The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the setting and atmosphere.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Introduce a conflict or tension to drive the scene forward, such as a disagreement between the characters or an unexpected obstacle.
Refine the dialogue to make it more nuanced and reflective of the characters' personalities and motivations.
Smooth out the transition between the jungle lab and the party scene to create a more cohesive narrative flow.
Explore the dynamics between Cockroach, Pablo, and Gustavo to add layers to their interactions and motivations.
Enhance the visual descriptions to paint a vivid picture of the settings and enhance the overall atmosphere of the scene.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, with a strong focus on the criminal activities of the characters and the escalating tensions within the drug trade. It effectively sets the tone for the ruthless and cutthroat nature of the drug cartel.

Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring the inner workings of a drug empire, including production, smuggling, and distribution, is executed with precision and detail. It provides a deep dive into the criminal underworld and the complexities of the drug trade.

Plot: 8

The plot revolves around the expansion of Pablo Escobar's drug empire, showcasing the strategic decisions and negotiations made by the characters to further their criminal activities. It sets the stage for future conflicts and developments within the story.

Originality: 8

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug trade, showcasing the internal and external conflicts within criminal organizations. The dialogue feels authentic and adds depth to the characters.

Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters, particularly Pablo Escobar, Gustavo, and Gacha, are well-developed and portrayed as ruthless yet calculating individuals within the drug trade. Their interactions and negotiations reveal their personalities and motivations.

Character Changes: 7

The characters, particularly Pablo Escobar, showcase subtle shifts in their alliances and strategies as they navigate the complex world of drug trafficking. These changes set the stage for future developments and conflicts within the story.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to assert his dominance and control over his partners, Gustavo and Pablo, and to maintain his position of power in the drug trade.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to showcase his cocaine production skills to his partners and secure his position as the leader of the operation.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The scene is filled with internal and external conflicts, including power struggles, negotiations, and the high-stakes world of drug trafficking. The tensions between the characters drive the narrative forward and create a sense of urgency.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals and power struggles creating tension and uncertainty.

High Stakes: 9

The scene is filled with high stakes, including the risks of drug production, smuggling, and distribution, as well as the power struggles and negotiations within the criminal underworld. The characters' decisions have far-reaching consequences, adding to the tension and suspense.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by establishing the expansion of Pablo Escobar's drug empire, introducing key characters and conflicts, and setting the stage for future events within the narrative. It propels the plot towards escalating tensions and high-stakes confrontations.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable due to the shifting power dynamics and the characters' conflicting goals.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around power dynamics, control, and loyalty. Cockroach's desire to maintain control clashes with Pablo and Gustavo's attempts to assert their influence over the operation.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

While the scene is intense and suspenseful, the emotional impact is somewhat muted due to the focus on the business aspects of the drug trade. However, the ruthlessness and calculated decisions of the characters evoke a sense of unease and tension.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp and businesslike, reflecting the pragmatic and strategic nature of the characters involved in the drug trade. It effectively conveys the power dynamics and negotiations within the criminal underworld.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its intense dialogue, power struggles, and the high stakes involved in the drug trade.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and highlights the power dynamics between the characters.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, effectively conveying the setting and character interactions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively conveys the power dynamics and conflicts between the characters.

EXT. MIAMI STREET/ALLEY - NIGHT

CAMERA TRACKS the RAT as it races through the alley.

MURPHY (V.O.)
It didn't take long for Miami to get
addicted. And I mean that.

The RAT stops. Nose wriggling.

LOW ANGLE - A STREET CORNER DRUG DEAL

A handoff between dealer and client.
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MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
It was like the whole city was running
around to get this shit. And with
the money, came the violence.

The RAT charges past--

A FOOT, as we TILT UP to reveal Murphy.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The surfers had been replaced by
Colombians. And these guys didn't
wear flip-flops.

HIS P.O.V. - TWO COLOMBIANS

Armed with Mac-10s. Their guns spit fire--

MURPHY AND KEVIN

dive for cover. They peek from behind a dumpster. One
Colombian flees. Murphy sees the other Colombian running
behind a car from left to right.

MURPHY FIRES THROUGH THE CAR. No one comes out from the
other side.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The Miami Coroner said Colombians
were like Dixie Cups. Use `em once,
then throw `em away.

MURPHY AND KEVIN

advance on the sprawled body behind the car. Kevin kneels
beside the dead shooter, turns back to Murphy.

KEVIN
Dude, he's just a kid.

The dead COLOMBIAN is about seventeen.

TIGHT - ON MURPHY

Stunned. And upset.

MURPHY (V.O.)
That was the first person I ever
shot. A teenager not old enough to
buy a six-pack.

CUT TO:
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EXT. MIAMI STREET/ALLEY - LATER

PARAMEDICS load the Colombian teen's corpse onto a
refrigerated truck. Murphy stands nearby.

MURPHY (V.O.)
The Dade County morgue couldn't fit
all the bodies from the drug war.
They had to rent a refrigerated truck
from a local company to hold all the
extra corpses.

PULLING BACK to see the logo: "BURGER KING."

CUT TO:

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - MIAMI - NIGHT

Murphy swings open the door. He's exhausted, crestfallen,
and strangely guilty. Connie rises from the couch.

CONNIE
It was self-defense.

MURPHY
How'd you know?

CONNIE
Kevin called. He's worried about
you.

MURPHY
The kid was seventeen.

CONNIE
He sells drugs, right?

MURPHY
Yeah.

CONNIE
Then fuck him.

MURPHY
What?

CONNIE
Do you know what's going on here?
This city's upside down.
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Murphy looks at her in surprise. It's only now he realizes
her mascara's streaked.

CUT TO:

A GURNEY

Rolls past with an unconscious PREGNANT WOMAN. She's one of
the Colombian girls we saw with Lion.

CONNIE (O.S.)
I was about to finish my shift when
we got hit with lights and sirens.

INT. MIAMI GENERAL - EMERGENCY ROOM - DAY

Connie quickly evaluates the unconscious GIRL.

CONNIE (O.S.)
Paramedics said she collapsed after
she got off her flight. By the time
she got to us, she was barely
breathing.

Everything in this sequence is frantic--

CONNIE (CONT'D)
Tachycardia! We need an EKG, stat!

Connie coils a blood pressure cuff on her arm at lightning
speed. NURSE #2 clips on a pulse oximeter.

CONNIE (O.S.) (CONT'D)
Dilated pupils, rapid pulse. I knew
she'd overdosed on cocaine.

Connie and NURSE #2 put the GIRL on her left side.

CONNIE (CONT'D)
180cc of benzodiazepine! She's going
into arrest!

CONNIE (O.S.) (CONT'D)
But she had no residue on her
nostrils, no injection marks.

The girl's convulsing. Connie grabs the defibrillators and
administers three high-voltage shocks.

CONNIE (O.S.) (CONT'D)
We did everything we could. She
died in the ER.
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CONNIE (CONT'D)
(checking clock)
TOD, eleven hundred and twenty-two
minutes.

Connie puts a stethoscope to the girl's abdomen.

CONNIE (CONT'D)
The baby's still alive. I need a
surgeon for an emergency C-section!
Get a prenatal unit down here now!

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - MIAMI - NIGHT

Murphy stares at Connie, shocked.

MURPHY
What happened?

CONNIE
The baby died in my hands.

MURPHY
I'm sorry.

CLOSE - ON THE X-RAY

It's the pregnant woman, post-mortem. We SEE her ribs, spine,
and fifty-five condoms of coke on the X-ray.

CONNIE (O.S.)
She was body-packing eleven ounces
of cocaine. Two of the pellets split
open.

INT. MIAMI GENERAL - HALLWAY - DAY

Connie, splattered with blood, stands numbly in front of a
light board, looking at the X-ray.

CONNIE (O.S.)
Twelve grams in her bloodstream.

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - MIAMI - NIGHT

WIDER, ON CONNIE and MURPHY

CONNIE
No one survives that.

CUT TO:
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Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Dark, Intense, Emotional

Summary Murphy and Kevin engage in a deadly shootout with armed Colombians, resulting in the death of a teenage suspect. Amidst the chaos, news reaches Murphy of a pregnant woman's fatal cocaine overdose, leaving her baby as the sole survivor of the tragedy.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Realistic portrayal of drug war
High stakes and tension

Weaknesses

Potentially triggering content
Graphic violence

General Critique

The transition from the rat in the alley to the drug deal is abrupt and lacks a smooth connection.
The voiceover narration by Murphy feels heavy-handed and could be more subtle in conveying the themes of addiction and violence.
The shootout scene with the Colombians lacks tension and suspense, making it feel somewhat flat.
The dialogue between Murphy and Kevin after the shooting could be more impactful and emotional to convey the weight of the situation.
The scene at the morgue with the Burger King truck logo feels out of place and disrupts the flow of the narrative.
The interaction between Murphy and Connie in his apartment lacks depth and emotional resonance given the gravity of the events being discussed.
The medical emergency scene at the hospital feels rushed and could benefit from more detailed descriptions to enhance the sense of urgency and drama.
The revelation of the pregnant woman's death and the discovery of the cocaine packets in her body lacks a strong emotional impact and could be more effectively portrayed.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider revising the transition between scenes to create a smoother flow of events.
Refine the voiceover narration to be more nuanced and integrated into the storytelling.
Enhance the tension and stakes in the shootout scene to make it more engaging for the audience.
Develop the dialogue between characters to deepen their emotional connections and reactions to the events unfolding.
Reconsider the inclusion of the Burger King truck logo and ensure that all visual elements contribute cohesively to the narrative.
Focus on building a more authentic and compelling relationship between Murphy and Connie to elevate their interactions.
Expand on the medical emergency scene to build suspense and highlight the intensity of the situation.
Revise the reveal of the pregnant woman's death to evoke a stronger emotional response and emphasize the tragic consequences of drug trafficking.

Expert Suggestions

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Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful, effectively conveying the harsh realities of the drug war and the emotional turmoil experienced by the characters. It sets a dark and intense tone that keeps the audience engaged.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring the drug trade from multiple perspectives, including law enforcement and medical professionals, is compelling and adds depth to the narrative. The scene effectively portrays the consequences of drug trafficking.

Plot: 9

The plot is gripping and well-executed, showcasing the escalating violence and moral dilemmas faced by the characters. The scene moves the story forward significantly and sets up future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh and authentic take on the drug war narrative, with unique character interactions and intense emotional moments that set it apart from typical crime dramas.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their emotional struggles are portrayed convincingly. The scene effectively conveys the internal conflicts faced by the DEA agents and medical professionals, adding depth to their personalities.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant emotional changes in the scene, particularly Murphy and Connie. They are forced to confront the harsh realities of their work and grapple with the moral implications of their actions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to come to terms with the consequences of his actions, particularly the first person he has ever shot, who turns out to be a teenager.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to navigate the dangerous drug-infested world of Miami and survive the violence and chaos.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The scene is filled with conflict, both internal and external, as the characters grapple with the consequences of their actions and the violence of the drug war. The high stakes and intense emotions drive the conflict forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the protagonist facing dangerous drug dealers, violent Colombians, and moral dilemmas that challenge his beliefs and values.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high in the scene, with lives on the line and moral dilemmas at play. The characters are faced with difficult choices that will have far-reaching consequences, adding tension and suspense to the narrative.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, introducing new conflicts and consequences that will shape the narrative. It sets up future events and deepens the overall plot of the series.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists and turns in the protagonist's journey, the moral dilemmas he faces, and the shocking revelations about the drug war.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict is between the protagonist's moral compass and the harsh reality of the drug war. He struggles with the ethical implications of his actions in a violent world.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of sadness, guilt, and shock in the audience. The tragic events and moral dilemmas faced by the characters resonate deeply, leaving a lasting impression.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is realistic and impactful, conveying the emotional weight of the situation. It effectively communicates the characters' thoughts and feelings, enhancing the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its intense and emotional moments, realistic portrayal of violence, and the protagonist's internal conflict, which keeps the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the protagonist's journey through the dangerous world of Miami.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue that enhance the overall narrative.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively builds tension and develops the protagonist's internal and external goals within the context of the drug war setting.

EXT. HACIENDA NAPOLES - ANTIOQUIA - NIGHT

A HIPPOPOTAMUS wanders through FRAME. One of the many animals
who roam the luxurious grounds of Napoles. Gustavo stands
out in the yard with Cockroach. He indicates Cockroach's
gold-plated Mercedes.

GUSTAVO
You're ten times richer than you
ever thought you could be.

COCKROACH
I just want my fair cut. If it wasn't
for me, you two would still be
smuggling cigarettes.

Gustavo goes stone-cold serious.

GUSTAVO
Let me give you a piece of advice.
Don't talk like this to Pablo. He's
not as forgiving as I am.

CUT TO:

OVERHEAD SHOT

Thirty TRUCKS behind the jeep, passing through FRAME (same
as earlier shot in the script).

MURPHY (V.O.)
Cockroach should have listened to
Gustavo. Instead, he found another
way to get his fair share.

OVER THE SHOULDER: A COP

A police checkpoint. The LEAD TRUCK pulls to a stop. The
DRIVER rolls down his window to find Colonel Herrera and a
group of other DAS Agents, seen earlier.

HERRERA
What's in those spare tires?

CUT TO:

INT. HACIENDA NAPOLES - ANTIOQUIA - DAY

GUSTAVO hangs up the phone and approaches PABLO, who watches
a soccer game on television.
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GUSTAVO
390 kilos. We lost it.

PABLO
What do you mean we lost it?

GUSTAVO
What I said. We lost it.

PABLO
It just disappeared? Into thin air?

GUSTAVO
Don't bust my balls. Cops must've
followed them from Ipsalia.

PABLO
We've paid every cop from here to
Ipsalia. How'd we lose a load?

GUSTAVO
Somewhere in Colombia there exists
an honest cop.

PABLO
How much is he asking for?

GUSTAVO
Too much.

PABLO
I'm going down there.

Gustavo knows Pablo too well.

GUSTAVO
Why risk it? It's only 390 keys.

CUT TO:

INT. POLICE HEADQUARTERS - MEDELLÍN - DAY

Pablo strolls in to find Colonel Herrera and Nacho Ibarra.

PABLO
What's going on?

HERRERA
We need to renegotiate.

PABLO
Fuck you.
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INT. POLICE HEADQUARTERS - LINE-UP ROOM - MEDELLÍN - DAY

Now handcuffed, Pablo stands with an ID placard with the day
and date of his arrest.

TWO SHOT - HERRERA AND IBARRA

Through the one-way glass, they watch a photographer preparing
to take the mugshot of Pablo.

IBARRA
Are you sure about this? He hasn't
said a word since you arrested him.

HERRERA
We're DAS. What's he gonna do about
it?

CUT TO:

OVER THE SHOULDER: THE POLICE PHOTOGRAPHER

Pablo smiles for the camera. CLICK.

MATCH CUT TO:

PABLO'S MUGSHOT (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

The famous one. Inmate Number: 128482

MURPHY (V.O.)
Pablo didn't know it then, but this
mugshot was gonna cause him a lotta
grief down the line.

CUT TO:

INT. POLICE HEADQUARTERS - INTERROGATION - MEDELLÍN - DAY

Pablo sits calmly at a table. Herrera enters with Ibarra.

HERRERA
We count over three hundred kilos on
those trucks. That's a street value
of over four million in American
currency. But you only pay us a
hundred fifty thousand.

PABLO
That's what we agreed on.
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HERRERA
(enjoying this)
I make deals for a living. You can
accept my deal or accept the
consequences for not taking it. Now
why don't we renegotiate a bit and
we can all leave happy.

Pablo mulls this, then--

PABLO
I'll give you a million dollars,
U.S., on one condition.

HERRERA
What's that?

PABLO
Somebody in my organization told you
the street price of my cocaine.
Otherwise how would you know? Tell
me who it is and you won't have to
split the money with him.

CUT TO:

EXT. PORT OF MIAMI - DAY

A PLUMBING VAN drives past the cargo crates.

MURPHY (V.O.)
It turns out Cockroach was a real
cockroach. Not only did he sell
Pablo to the authorities, he was
stealing from him all along and
selling coke in Miami, too.

The VAN pulls up to a MERCEDES. GERMAN ZAPATA, 40s, sleek
as a greyhound, gets out. He's accompanied by TWO BODYGUARDS.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Cockroach's dealer was German Zapata,
a Colombian with a plumbing business
that served as a front for his cocaine
operation. He had twelve hundred
keys in the van. And guess who was
buying the load?

THE MERCEDES DOORS OPEN

Murphy and Kevin get out, wearing guayabera shirts.
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ZAPATA
Gentlemen.

MURPHY
Mr. Zapata. A pleasure.

Kevin walks to the back of the Mercedes and opens--

THE TRUNK

It's packed with two duffel bags of CASH.

MURPHY, KEVIN AND ZAPATA

walk to the back of the plumbing van.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The plan was to trade vehicles and
Zapata would be arrested once he
left the Port.

Zapata opens the back to reveal--

A HUGE AMOUNT OF COCAINE

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Twelve hundred kilos - that would
get us on the cover of the Miami
Herald.

Murphy exchanges car keys with Zapata.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Everything was going perfect, except
that Pablo was onto Cockroach.

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Intense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Serious

Summary Gustavo warns Cockroach about Pablo's wrath, while Pablo suspects betrayal within his ranks. Cockroach's double-dealing is revealed, as he sold Pablo out while running a cocaine operation in Miami. Pablo negotiates with the police, seeking information on a lost drug shipment. Tensions rise as Pablo becomes aware of the betrayal within his organization.

Strengths

Tension-building
Sharp dialogue
Character dynamics

Weaknesses

Limited emotional depth
Lack of character development

General Critique

The scene lacks a clear transition between the previous scene at Hacienda Napoles and the police headquarters in Medellin, causing a disjointed feel.
The dialogue between Gustavo and Cockroach feels a bit forced and on-the-nose, lacking subtlety in conveying the power dynamics between the characters.
The introduction of the police checkpoint and the conversation with Colonel Herrera feels abrupt and could benefit from smoother pacing and development.
The negotiation scene between Pablo, Gustavo, and the police lacks depth and complexity, missing an opportunity to delve into the intricate relationships and tensions between the characters.
The revelation about Cockroach's betrayal and Pablo's realization could be more impactful with a build-up of tension and suspense.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding a smoother transition between the scenes to improve the flow of the narrative.
Refine the dialogue between Gustavo and Cockroach to make it more nuanced and reflective of their relationship dynamics.
Develop the police checkpoint scene further to build tension and suspense, enhancing the stakes of the situation.
Expand on the negotiation scene to delve deeper into the characters' motivations and conflicts, adding layers to the interaction.
Build up the revelation of Cockroach's betrayal and Pablo's realization to create a more dramatic and impactful moment in the scene.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds tension and sets up a major conflict within the story. The dialogue is sharp and impactful, revealing the complex relationships between the characters.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of betrayal and negotiation in the criminal underworld is well-executed, adding depth to the characters and advancing the plot.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the revelation of betrayal and the negotiation between Pablo and the police. It sets the stage for future conflicts and developments.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug cartel world, with unique character dynamics, intense conflicts, and unexpected plot twists. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined and their motivations are clear, especially in terms of loyalty and betrayal. Pablo's cunning nature and Gustavo's loyalty add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 7

The scene hints at potential character changes, especially in terms of trust and loyalty, setting the stage for future developments.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain control and power within the drug cartel, while also navigating the risks and betrayals that come with their criminal activities.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to recover lost drugs and negotiate with law enforcement to avoid consequences for their actions.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Pablo and the police, as well as the internal conflict within the criminal organization, creates a high level of tension and suspense.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts arising from law enforcement, betrayals, and internal power struggles, creating obstacles for the protagonist to overcome.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of betrayal, negotiation, and potential consequences add urgency and intensity to the scene, raising the tension and suspense.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing betrayal, negotiation, and escalating tensions within the criminal organization.

Unpredictability: 8.5

The scene is unpredictable with unexpected betrayals, plot twists, and character motivations, adding layers of complexity and suspense.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict revolves around the protagonist's moral compass and the corrupt nature of the world they operate in. It challenges their values and decisions as they navigate through treacherous situations.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes tension and suspense, but also hints at deeper emotional layers within the characters, especially in terms of loyalty and betrayal.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is sharp, tense, and reveals the power dynamics at play. It effectively conveys the characters' emotions and intentions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its intense conflicts, high stakes, and unpredictable plot developments, keeping the audience invested in the characters' fates.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of suspenseful moments, character interactions, and plot revelations that maintain the audience's interest.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8.5

The scene adheres to the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format with clear transitions between locations and events, maintaining a cohesive narrative flow.

EXT. PORT OF MIAMI - DAY

CAMERA FOLLOWS over the shoulder of two ASSASSINS on a
Kawasaki, heading into the long term parking. On the back
of the cycle is--

LA QUICA, a hitman who works for Pablo.

He pulls out his Mac-10 and fires.

BOOM! - ZAPATA AND KEVIN

drop like stones.

ZAPATA'S BODYGUARD
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returns fire.

The DRIVER gets blown off the cycle. It spins out on the
concrete pavement.

LA QUICA

scrambles to his feet, raising his Mac-10.

MURPHY

steps forward, about to fire--

LA QUICA

drops his Mac-10 and raises his hands.

LA QUICA
(accented)
I give up! Arrest me.

Hands high, he drops to his knees.

MURPHY

lowers his weapon as--

A SWARM OF DEA AGENTS

arrive to arrest La Quica.

CLOSE - ON KEVIN

Dead from a bullet wound to the skull.

CUT TO:

AN AMERICAN FLAG

Flapping in the wind above the Miami-Dade Courthouse.

MURPHY (V.O.)
I got to the courthouse early on the
day of La Quica's trial.

EXT. COURTHOUSE - MIAMI - DAY

Murphy climbs the steps to enter the courthouse.

MURPHY (V.O.)
My testimony was gonna put that
bastard on death row.
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He's buttonholed by a U.S. PROSECUTOR.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
The U.S. District Attorney caught me
on the courthouse steps, said La
Quica met his bail of two million
dollars, paid by a wire transfer
from-- well, why don't you take a
guess?

CUT TO:

BOARDING GATE - "MEDELLÍN, COLOMBIA"

INT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

La Quica walks onto a plane.

MURPHY (V.O.)
La Quica boarded and was back in
Medellín by midnight.

INT. MURPHY'S APARTMENT - BEDROOM - MIAMI - NIGHT

Connie sleeps in Murphy's arms. He stares at the ceiling.

MURPHY (V.O.)
From `79 through `84, there were
3245 murders in Miami.

MONTAGE: MIAMI AND MEDELLÍN (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

This sequence will be built from archival footage: Murders,
mayhem, boat-lifts and coke seizures.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
But outside of the Florida Tourist
Bureau and the cops, no one much
cared about that.

EXT. WHITE HOUSE - WASHINGTON, DC - DAY (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

Establishing.

MURPHY (V.O.)
What got the U.S. government to take
notice was the money. Billions of
dollars a year, all of it flowing
from the U.S. to Colombia. And that,
America could not take.
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INT. OVAL OFFICE ANTEROOM - DAY

FOUR BUSINESSMEN are seated on a couch.

MURPHY (V.O.)
See these guys? That's Gerald Ottman
from General Electric. Jack Rogers
from Miami National Bank. Paul
Griggs, Goldman Sachs. And Bill
Taub from the City Workers Pension
Fund. They were terrified the narco-
economy would sink the real economy
of Miami.

A SECRETARY enters the room.

SECRETARY
The President will see you now.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Or maybe they were pissed off they
weren't getting a cut.

Inside the Oval Office, a Reaganesque figure can be seen
sitting behind his desk (not identifiable).

INT. OVAL OFFICE - DAY

The Businessmen enter. The President stands and shakes hands
with his guests.

BUSINESS
Mr. President. Thank you for having
us.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Whatever it was, the businessmen
came at just the right time. The
Berlin Wall was about to fall. The
Soviet Union was dissolving. It was
time for America to suit up against
a new enemy.

INT. OVAL OFFICE - DAY (ARCHIVAL FOOTAGE)

RONALD and NANCY REAGAN sit on the couch.

RONALD REAGAN
Tonight, from our family to yours,
from our home to yours.

CLOSE - ON RONALD REAGAN
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RONALD REAGAN (CONT'D)
Drugs are menacing our society.
They're threatening our values and
undercutting our institutions.
(then)
They're killing our children.

MURPHY (V.O.)
It was classic Reagan. Folksy,
direct, and tough. He vowed to go
after drugs at the source. But it
was Nancy who stole the show.

CLOSE - ON NANCY REAGAN

NANCY REAGAN
So to my young friends out there,
life can be great. But not when you
can't see it. So open your eyes to
life, to see it in the vivid colors
that God gave us as a precious gift
to His children. Say yes to your
life. And when it comes to drugs
and alcohol, just say no.

CUT TO:

TIGHT - ON COCKROACH: BEATEN AND BLOODY

COCKROACH
No, no, no!!!

A BULLET blasts him in the forehead.

INT. HACIENDA NAPOLES - ANTIOQUIA - DAY

Cockroach topples to the ground.

MURPHY (V.O.)
They say when a nuclear holocaust
comes, only the cockroaches will
survive.

CAMERA SWIVELS to find Pablo. Gun outstretched.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
I guess they were wrong.

Pablo turns to Poison.

PABLO
Clean this up.
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Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Intense, Suspenseful, Dark, Dramatic

Summary Assassins on motorcycles, one being La Quica, kill Zapata and Kevin in a parking lot. DEA agent Murphy confronts La Quica and arrests him after he surrenders. Despite Murphy's testimony, La Quica posts bail and flees to Colombia. Murphy reflects on the violence and corruption prevalent during Miami's drug war, highlighting the involvement of the US government in its suppression.

Strengths

Intense action
Compelling characters
Political intrigue
Emotional depth

Weaknesses

Potential for confusion with multiple storylines
Some characters may need more development

General Critique

The scene lacks a clear transition from the previous scenes, making it feel disjointed and abrupt.
The shootout between the assassins and Zapata and Kevin is intense but lacks emotional depth or character development.
The resolution of La Quica surrendering feels rushed and anticlimactic, missing an opportunity for a more impactful confrontation.
The shift to Murphy's testimony at La Quica's trial feels disconnected from the action of the shootout, causing a jarring shift in tone.
The montage of archival footage and political discussions detracts from the immediate tension of the scene and disrupts the flow of the narrative.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scenes to establish a better flow of events.
Enhance the emotional impact of the shootout by delving deeper into the characters' reactions and motivations.
Build up the confrontation between La Quica and Murphy to create a more suspenseful and satisfying resolution.
Integrate Murphy's testimony more seamlessly into the scene to maintain the tension and focus on the immediate aftermath of the shootout.
Reconsider the use of the montage and political discussions to ensure they complement the narrative without overshadowing the main action.

Expert Suggestions

Suggestion by Unknown Expert

Ratings

Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, with a mix of action, drama, and political commentary that keeps the audience on the edge of their seats. The intense showdown, courtroom trial, and political discussions add depth and complexity to the narrative.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene revolves around the escalating conflict between law enforcement and drug traffickers, as well as the political response to the drug trade. It effectively portrays the interconnectedness of crime, politics, and society.

Plot: 9

The plot is well-developed, with a clear progression from the shootout in Miami to the courtroom trial. The introduction of political figures and their stance on drugs adds layers to the narrative, setting the stage for future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to familiar themes of crime and justice. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the narrative.

Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are compelling, especially La Quica, Murphy, and the political figures. Their actions and motivations drive the plot forward and add depth to the overall story.

Character Changes: 7

The characters undergo subtle changes, especially La Quica facing arrest and Murphy grappling with the consequences of his actions. These changes set the stage for future developments in the story.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to bring down La Quica and seek justice for the murders committed. This reflects his deeper desire for law and order, as well as his fear of the escalating violence and corruption in the drug trade.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to testify against La Quica in court and ensure he is put on death row. This reflects the immediate challenge of bringing a dangerous criminal to justice and stopping the flow of drug money.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The scene is filled with conflict, from the intense shootout to the courtroom trial and political debates. The clash between law enforcement and drug traffickers, as well as the moral dilemmas faced by the characters, heighten the tension.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with multiple obstacles and conflicts that challenge the protagonist's goals and motivations, keeping the audience on edge.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high throughout the scene, from the life-threatening shootout to the courtroom trial with potential death row consequences. The political implications of the drug trade add another layer of high stakes.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward, introducing key conflicts, characters, and themes that will shape the narrative. It sets the stage for future confrontations and developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the sudden twists, betrayals, and unexpected outcomes that challenge the characters' goals and motivations.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between law and criminality, justice and corruption. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in upholding the law and seeking justice, while also highlighting the moral ambiguity of the drug trade.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes strong emotions, from the adrenaline of the shootout to the drama of the courtroom trial. The political discussions add a layer of complexity and emotional weight to the narrative.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is sharp and impactful, especially during the courtroom trial and political discussions. It effectively conveys the tension and stakes of the situation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its fast-paced action, high stakes, and moral dilemmas that keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension, maintaining momentum, and transitioning between different locations and characters seamlessly.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with proper scene headings, action descriptions, and character cues.

Structure: 9

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear action beats, dialogue exchanges, and transitions between locations.

EXT. COLOMBIAN ROAD - MEDELLÍN - NIGHT

Misty night.

MURPHY (V.O.)
Over his career, Pablo would kill
over a thousand cops. But I wouldn't
learn that till later.

WIDE SHOT - COLONEL HERRERA AND NACHO IBARRA

The DAS Agents lie sprawled on the ground. They've been
tortured and shot in the head.

CUT TO:

PEOPLE CROSS THROUGH FRAME

Revealing airport departing gates.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
My dad volunteered to fight in World
War II because of Pearl Harbor.

INT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - NIGHT

The international departure terminal.

MURPHY (V.O.)
But you think he knew anybody in
Hawaii? No way.

WIDE SHOT

Two tiny figures walk toward CAMERA.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
He was a West Virginia farmboy. But
these fuckers stepped on our soil.

The figures get closer.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
So he laced up his Army boots and
went to fight. It was his duty.

It's Murphy and Connie, walking into a TWO SHOT.

MURPHY (V.O.) (CONT'D)
Cocaine in Miami? Powder from
Colombia? This was my war.
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REVERSING, OVER SHOULDER as they board a plane. TILT UP to
see the departure sign: "Bogota, Colombia."

EXT. MIAMI INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT - DAY

The PLANE races down the runway.

MURPHY (V.O.)
This was my duty. And I was ready
to fight.

The airplane lifts off into the sky.

INT. HACIENDA NAPOLES - ANTIOQUIA - DAY

La Quica reports to Pablo.

PABLO
They killed Poison? Where?

LA QUICA
La Dispensaria.

PABLO
Who did it?

LA QUICA
I think it was Carillo. He got there
early the next day. But that DEA
guy was there taking pictures.

Pablo smolders for a beat.

PABLO
Raise the bounty.

LA QUICA
On Carillo?

PABLO
No. I'll pay half a million for the
head of a DEA agent.
(then)
Fucking gringos.

Off Pablo--

FADE OUT.

(TO BE CONTINUED)

Genres: Crime, Drama, Thriller
Tone: Intense, Dark, Suspenseful

Summary Murphy contemplates his father's war experience and likens his own fight against the Colombian cocaine trade to a personal war. After a brutal attack on DAS agents, Murphy and Connie embark on a mission to Bogota. Meanwhile, Pablo Escobar, upon learning of Poison's death, raises the bounty on Carillo's head.

Strengths

Intense atmosphere
Strong character dynamics
Compelling conflict

Weaknesses

Potential for excessive violence
Lack of resolution for some plot points

General Critique

The transition from the brutal scene of DAS Agents being tortured and shot in the head to Murphy's voiceover about his father's duty in World War II feels disjointed and lacks a smooth connection.
The voiceover narration by Murphy is informative but could be more emotionally engaging to draw the audience in and create a stronger connection to the character's motivations.
The dialogue between La Quica and Pablo lacks depth and complexity, missing an opportunity to delve into the characters' emotions and motivations further.
The scene ends abruptly with Pablo's declaration to raise the bounty on a DEA agent's head, leaving the audience hanging without a satisfying resolution or closure.
There is a lack of visual storytelling in this scene, with minimal description of the surroundings or character actions, making it feel flat and less immersive.

Expert Critiques

Critique by Unknown Expert

General Suggestions

Consider restructuring the scene to create a smoother transition between the violent imagery of the DAS Agents and Murphy's personal reflections, enhancing the emotional impact.
Revise the voiceover narration to add more depth and personal connection to Murphy's character, allowing the audience to empathize with his internal struggles and motivations.
Develop the dialogue between La Quica and Pablo to reveal more about their relationship, dynamics, and conflicting emotions, adding layers to their interactions.
Provide a more conclusive ending to the scene by adding a moment of reflection or reaction from Pablo after deciding to raise the bounty, giving the audience a sense of closure.
Enhance the visual elements in the scene by incorporating detailed descriptions of the setting, character movements, and facial expressions to create a more vivid and engaging cinematic experience.

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Ratings

Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the intense and dark tone of the series, introducing key characters and conflicts while building suspense for future events.

Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the escalating drug war, the moral dilemmas faced by law enforcement, and the ruthless nature of drug traffickers are well-established and engaging.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly, introducing key conflicts, character motivations, and setting up future confrontations between law enforcement and drug traffickers.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the drug war narrative, with authentic dialogue, complex characters, and a focus on internal conflicts. The actions and dialogue feel genuine and contribute to the authenticity of the story.

Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters are intriguing and well-defined, with Pablo Escobar standing out as a ruthless and intelligent leader. Murphy's internal conflict adds depth to the narrative.

Character Changes: 7

Murphy's internal conflict and Pablo's ruthless actions hint at potential character development and changes in future episodes.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with his duty and sense of responsibility in the face of the drug war. It reflects his deeper need for purpose and his desire to make a difference in a chaotic world.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to fight against drug trafficking and bring justice to those involved. It reflects the immediate circumstances of the drug war and the challenges he faces in his mission.

Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between law enforcement and drug traffickers, as well as internal conflicts faced by characters, creates a high level of tension and suspense.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with complex challenges, moral dilemmas, and conflicting motivations that create uncertainty and suspense. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the characters will navigate the obstacles.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of the drug trade, the escalating violence, and the personal risks faced by characters raise the tension and importance of the events unfolding.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward, setting up key events and conflicts that will drive the narrative forward.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists, moral ambiguity, and character decisions that keep the audience on edge. The outcome is uncertain, adding to the tension and suspense.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between duty and personal values. The protagonist grapples with the moral implications of his actions in the face of a dangerous and corrupt world.

Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension to moral contemplation, adding depth to the narrative.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is sharp and impactful, revealing character dynamics and motivations effectively.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its tense atmosphere, moral dilemmas, and complex character interactions. The dialogue and actions keep the audience invested in the story and characters.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension, revealing character motivations, and advancing the plot. The rhythm of the scene keeps the audience engaged and invested in the story.

Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and character dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.

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Murphy - Score: 80/100

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Foundational Definition 8/10

Complexity And Depth 7/10

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Pablo - Score: 78/100

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