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INT. MAZDA - CONTINUOUS SIXTO REYES (30s) nervously steers the Mazda. His daughter LUCIA REYES, an 8-year-old with bobbed hair, a pink bomber jacket and a birthmark, sits in the passenger seat, eating chicken nuggets and doing homework.
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EXT. LOS ANGELES STREET - LATER DETECTIVES RAE WHEELER and BEN HOLLOWAY walk through pools of flickering streetlight towards Sixto's darkened Mazda, which now sits crookedly with two wheels on the curb. Wheeler – late 30s – sports a cheap windbreaker and shoes
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INT. BODEGA STORE ROOM – LATER Wheeler and Holloway stare at a cheap TV hooked to a VCR. They’re surrounded by liquor, scratch-off cards, old Playboys. No one grows up dreaming of opening a place like this – except for maybe this SHOPKEEPER, a 40-something
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INT/EXT. – UNMARKED CRUISER – LATER Wheeler and Holloway's unmarked cruiser speeds through nighttime LA. Wheeler drives, her eyes dancing with thought. A talk show spills from the radio - HOST (V.O.)
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INT. MEDICAL CENTER ROOM - NIGHT Wheeler's eyes flutter open - milky, lost, searching... she seems to be in a hospital room. She's attached to a machine by tubes, wearing a heavy rubber respirator. She motions to a NURSE, who lifts it off.
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INT. MEDICAL CENTER ROOM - LATER Holloway stands at the foot of Wheeler's bed as the nurse heads out of the room. The second she's gone he leans over and starts unplugging Wheeler's tubes. HOLLOWAY (CONTD)
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INT. HALLWAY - CONTINUOUS They limp down another hall, moving slowly through the antiseptic, colorless world. HOLLOWAY After your accident Molly got a job
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INT. PARKING GARAGE - LATER Holloway presses a button on his key fob and a battered self-driving car glides up, its doors sliding open. INT./EXT. HOLLOWAY'S CAR - NIGHT Wheeler leans against the window, catches her confused
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EXT. APARTMENT BLOCK - LATER The car glides to a stop in front of a tower block made of shipping containers clad in Russian logos. Holloway limps out, Wheeler wobbling behind him, still unsteady. Wheeler's eyes rise to the billboards stretching across the
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INT. HOLLOWAY'S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS A decrepit studio: takeaway boxes and old scratch-off cards. A stained sofa with a shopping bag on it. 16. HOLLOWAY
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EXT. LI'S SUPPER CLUB - NIGHT Wheeler and Holloway hobble through a parking lot towards a neon-soaked diner: Li's Supper Club. INT. LI'S SUPPER CLUB - CONTINUOUS The pair sit in a booth, working on protein burgers.
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INT. HOLLOWAY'S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Disaster footage from The Event plays on a Smart Wall. Wheeler watches bleary-eyed on the sofa, unable to sleep. PODCAST HOST (PRELAP) Welcome back to Transitions, a
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INT. HOLLOWAY'S LIVING ROOM - LATER Holloway sits at a table with half a grapefruit and a stack of old LA Times newspapers. He looks up as Wheeler enters. HOLLOWAY Couldn't sleep?
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EXT. PORT OF LOS ANGELES - DAY Hulking machines and cranes rise out of the morning smog in the decaying Port of Los Angeles. Wheeler and Holloway march through the misty dockyards towards a supervisor.
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EXT. REPAIR ROOM - LATER The trio stand in a mech repair room. Wheeler and Holloway drink steaming coffee from paper cups as Guerrero unscrews one of his arms, replacing it with a grab-loader. WHEELER
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EXT. DOWNTOWN LOS ANGELES - DAY A sleek black-glass skyscraper stretches into a perfect California sky. This is the New Aon Center, where billion- dollar deals are as common as car fires on the 405. HOLLOWAY (PRELAP)
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INT. BOARD ROOM - CONTINUOUS A GROUP of high-power businessmen circle a conference table. 25. SONNY D'ALESIO, now 45, immaculate in a Brooks Brothers suit, his tattoos lazered off, addresses the group -
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INT. HALLWAY - LATER Holloway and Wheeler walk down a long hallway, passing execs in suits along the way. WHEELER The Jolly Rancher grabbed Lucia...
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INT. LOZANO'S CRUISER - LATER Lozano's self-driving rent-a-cruiser tears through the LA dusk, past sooty shells of bungalows devoured by wildfires. Lozano checks her .45 ACP - locked and loaded. She peeks under her shirt, revealing a cheap-looking
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EXT. OVERGROWN LOT - CONTINUOUS The musclehead sees Lozano and takes off down an alley between two houses. She races after him as he crashes through a rotting wooden fence, not stopping, heading through a yard, smashing through the door of a house...
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EXT. OVERGROWN LOT - LATER Lozano gingerly limps towards her cruiser, bruised and defeated. She looks up to see Wheeler and Holloway. WHEELER Anna Lozano?
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EXT. THE L.A. LIVE COMPLEX - LATER Wheeler, Holloway and Lozano share drinks from a paper bag as they walk through the ruins of the LA Live Complex. LOZANO I come here on this night every year,
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EXT. SUBURBAN STREET - DAY A classic 4-bedroom house in the Valley - manicured yard, white picket fence. The American Dream. The front door opens and a family step out: A TANNED MAN in Izod, a WOMAN in Burberry and sunglasses. Between them is a
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EXT. LOS ANGELES CENTRAL LIBRARY - DAY A classic Mediterranean-inspired library in the shadows of sleek skyscrapers. WHEELER (V.O.) Old yearbooks are kept in the
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INT. LIBRARY BASEMENT - CONTINUOUS A huge, musty archive. Rows and rows of yellowing paper, books and files, stuff that hasn't seen light in years. Stacks of reviewed yearbooks sit in huge piles. The pile they haven't looked through is worryingly small.
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INT./EXT. HOLLOWAY'S CAR - NIGHT Holloway's car rolls through the steely modern canyons of Downtown Los Angeles. HOLLOWAY My guys didn't know much about Lonnie
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INT. LOZANO'S LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Wheeler and Holloway hunch over a laptop in a spartan apartment as Lozano navigates a Tor browser. LOZANO You said his nickname was the Jolly
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EXT. CANDYLAND NIGHTCLUB - NIGHT Holloway sits in his idling car outside a seedy nightclub, chomping on a cigar as men with LED tattoos pour out of pimped-out cars that park themselves. INT. CANDYLAND NIGHTCLUB - CONTINUOUS
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INT. HOLLOWAY'S CAR - CONTINUOUS Holloway stares out the car's windshield, the car idling, headlights on, eyes on the doorway. 47. EXT. CANDYLAND NIGHTCLUB - CONTINUOUS
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INT. HOLLOWAY'S CAR - NIGHT Holloway drags Wheeler into the backseat. The ear pig follows, climbing in as... Holloway slams the door, just as they're completely swallowed by the black cloud.
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INT. EZ MEDICAL CENTER - NIGHT Holloway limps through the door of a spartan room, struggling to support Wheeler's body. There's nothing but an operating table and a machine that looks like an ATM. He puts Wheeler on the table, and a laser scanner emerges,
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INT. HOSPITAL - DAY Wheeler watches a Smart Wall from a hospital bed. News footage fills the wall - a burning cop car in the 600 block of Dolly Lake - trails of blood - two dead private cops hanging from the overpass above Greene Street.
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INT. CITY HALL - DAY Wheeler's hand wraps around a sleek Glock 19; a green light on the gun blinks. A bored clerk slides some papers across a counter. CLERK
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INT. CITY HALL - CONTINUOUS Holloway makes his way across the floor, paperwork taken care of. He pokes his head into the vending room... INT. VENDING AREA - CONTINUOUS HOLLOWAY
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EXT. CHURCH HALL - LATER Lilly loiters outside the hall, smoking, as Wheeler exits. The sleeve of Lilly's jacket is pulled up, revealing a forearm covered in tattoos. These tattoos will eventually send Wheeler on a blood-soaked
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EXT. DOWNTOWN STREET - LATER Wheeler walks down a quiet street, stops in front of a pawn shop. The window is filled with unloved gadgets: old 3D food printers, VR projectors. Her eyes fall on an ancient iPhone. INT. WHEELER'S APARTMENT - LATER
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INT. WHEELER'S CAR - LATER Wheeler speeds down the street, her old-school 2020 phone pressed to her ear... WHEELER Anna, what was that trawler you used
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EXT. APARTMENT - DAY Wheeler and Holloway rap on the door of a modest apartment in a scuzzy complex. Vincent Guerrero opens it. GUERRERO Detectives. What a surprise.
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EXT. STREET - NIGHT Sixto's Mazda rolls beneath the bridge in Dolly Lake, the temp gauge maxed out. It runs out of power, dying on the side of the road. Sixto's panicking, drenched in sweat. He looks in his rear-view, sees Sonny D'Alesio dismounting,
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EXT. ALLEY - LATER A vehicle pulls up at the end of the darkened alley. Guerrero walks a crying Lucia to it, opens the back door, gives her a hug, and sits her inside the car. He shuts the door, nods to the woman in glasses (Cindy)
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INT. CITY HALL - DAY JOURNALISTS mill around an empty podium. Captain Studdebaker (40s), stands in the wings. Anna Lozano approaches. LOZANO Good turnout, Studdebaker. Busting
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EXT. STREET - NIGHT Wheeler walks towards a glowing storefront, the only source of light on the coal-black street. She disappears down a staircase beneath a flickering sign: Visit The Chronicle!

LAPD 2043

In a dystopian future Los Angeles, two veteran detectives are drawn back into the investigation of a child abduction case from 20 years ago, uncovering a web of corruption, trafficking, and technological advancements that have reshaped the city and its inhabitants.

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Discover a gritty, post-apocalyptic world filled with danger, suspense, and a relentless pursuit of justice in this captivating script. Featuring a grizzled detective, Wheeler, who wakes up from a 20-year coma to find herself in a futuristic society, and her determined partner, Holloway, who remains loyal and committed to solving the case despite his own personal demons. Together, they navigate a labyrinth of challenges, from de-extincted species and gamma radiation to human skin billboards and a powerful businessman with a dark past. With its unique blend of futuristic technology, noir-inspired detective work, and a haunting exploration of the consequences of past actions, this script offers a fresh and thrilling take on the crime genre. Dive into this immersive world and join Wheeler and Holloway on their quest for justice, redemption, and survival.

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Crime 35% Drama 30% Science Fiction 25% Thriller 25% Action 15%

Setting: The story takes place in the near future, after a major earthquake called 'The Event' and during a period of social unrest in Los Angeles., Los Angeles

Themes: Justice and Investigation, Loss and Grief, Perseverance and Determination, Corruption and Deceit, Futuristic Society and Technology

Conflict & Stakes: Wheeler's struggle to find the missing girl and clear her name, while dealing with the challenges of a futuristic and chaotic Los Angeles.

Mood: Dark and suspenseful, with a touch of noir.

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  • Unique Setting: The futuristic and chaotic Los Angeles, with its unique blend of technology and social unrest, provides a compelling backdrop for the story.
  • Strong Female Lead: Wheeler is a determined and resourceful detective, who is the driving force behind the investigation.
  • Complex Themes: The screenplay explores themes of justice, redemption, and the consequences of technology and social unrest, providing a thought-provoking and engaging narrative.

Comparable Scripts: Gone Girl, Prisoners, True Detective, Zodiac, Se7en

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