The whale
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Overview
Genres: Drama, Character, Study, Family, Slice, of, Life, Dark, Comedy
Setting: Present day, Small town in the Midwest
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates strong character development, emotional depth, and originality, but could benefit from improved pacing and resolution. The themes of redemption, personal growth, and human connection resonate well with audiences.
Themes: Mortality, Isolation, Desire for connection, Regret, Family, Religion, Doubt, Weight and physical health
Conflict and Stakes: John's struggle to clear his name after being falsely accused of a crime, with his family's reputation at stake
Overall Mood: Tense and suspenseful
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 5: Intense and dramatic as John confronts his accuser in court
- Scene 10: Emotional and cathartic as the truth is finally revealed
Standout Features:
- Twist Ending: Unexpected plot twist that will leave audiences shocked
- Unique Setting : Small town Midwest setting adds a distinctive atmosphere to the story
- Complex Characters : Well-developed characters with layers of depth and complexity
Comparable Scripts:
- The Fault in Our Stars
- Still Alice
- Big Fish
- Requiem for a Dream
- The Pursuit of Happyness
- The Descendants
- Silver Linings Playbook
- Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind
- A Single Man
- One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest
- The Perks of Being a Wallflower
- Terms of Endearment
- Little Miss Sunshine
- Birdman
- The Hours
- Ordinary People
- American Beauty
- About Schmidt
- Manchester by the Sea
- Atonement
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$15-20 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of legal thrillers and drama
Marketability: Strong central conflict and relatable themes that will resonate with audiences
Compelling characters and a gripping storyline, relevant social themes
Potential for critical acclaim and awards recognition, strong emotional core
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, depending on critical reception and awards recognition
Scene Level Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's original voice throughout the screenplay is characterized by raw and emotional dialogue, introspective moments, and concise narrative descriptions. The dialogue often reflects the characters' internal struggles and conflicts, while the narrative descriptions provide subtle but evocative details of the characters' actions and emotions. The writer's voice contributes to the overall mood, themes, and depth of the screenplay by creating a sense of authenticity and emotional intensity. It allows the audience to empathize with the characters' struggles and adds layers of meaning to their interactions.
Best representation: Scene 27 - Confrontation and Farewell. This scene could serve as the encapsulation of the writer's unique voice in the screenplay because it effectively conveys the intense emotions and inner conflicts of the characters through raw and honest dialogue.
Memorable Lines:
- LIZ: You say you’re sorry one more time I’m gonna shove a knife right into you, I swear to God-- (Scene 3)
- Ellie: Just being around you is disgusting. You smell disgusting. Your apartment is disgusting. You look disgusting. The last time I saw you, you were disgusting. (Scene 6)
- LIZ: GODDAMMIT CHARLIE, WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU? (Scene 8)
- Ellie: If you don’t take a hit I’m gonna call the police and tell them you tried to rape me. (Scene 18)
- Ellie: Just fucking die already. (Scene 21)
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'The Whale' is a deeply moving and character-driven drama that explores themes of regret, isolation, and the complexities of human relationships. The story follows Charlie, a morbidly obese man who is struggling with his deteriorating health and his estranged relationship with his daughter, Ellie. Through a series of poignant and well-crafted scenes, the screenplay delves into Charlie's past, his relationship with his late partner Alan, and his desire to reconnect with Ellie before it's too late. The screenplay features strong performances from the central characters, as well as a number of notable strengths, including the emotional resonance of the scenes exploring Charlie's inner world, the complexity of the relationships between the characters, and the overall thematic depth of the story. While there are a few areas that could benefit from further development, the screenplay is a strong and compelling piece of storytelling that is likely to resonate with audiences.
- The scene where Charlie remembers and reflects on the details of his relationship with Alan is very poignant and emotionally resonant, providing deeper insight into the character's past and motivations. high ( Scene 4 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - LATE THAT NIGHT) )
- The scene where Charlie and Ellie have a meaningful conversation and start to reconnect is a highlight, as it allows their complex relationship to be explored in a raw and honest way. high ( Scene 17 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - LATER THAT AFTERNOON) )
- The scenes that provide insight into Charlie's inner world and his attempts to confront his past and understand his choices are compelling and well-executed. medium ( Scene 9 (INT. - BEDROOM - EARLY MORNING) Scene 10 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - THAT AFTERNOON) )
- The scene where Charlie interacts with the pizza delivery boy, Danny, is a poignant moment that humanizes Charlie and highlights his isolation and loneliness. medium ( Scene 25 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - THAT NIGHT) )
- The scene where Mary confronts Charlie about the money he has been saving for Ellie is a powerful moment that reveals the complex dynamics of their relationship and Ellie's own struggles. high ( Scene 21 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - SHORTLY LATER) )
- The scene with Ellie and Thomas feels a bit uneven, with Ellie's behavior veering a bit too far into erratic and confrontational territory, which could be tightened up to maintain a more consistent tone. medium ( Scene 18 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - LATER) )
- The scene where Thomas confronts Charlie about his relationship with Alan could be further developed to provide more nuance and complexity, rather than relying on a somewhat simplistic religious interpretation. medium ( Scene 26 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS) )
- The interaction between Mary and Charlie, while powerful, could be expanded upon to further explore their shared history and the complexities of their relationship, which could add depth to their characters. medium ( Scene 22 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - LATER THAT EVENING) )
- While the opening sequence provides a solid introduction to the story and Charlie's teaching work, a more visually striking or thematically resonant opening could help draw the audience in and set the tone more effectively. medium ( Scene 1 (Opening credits over black.) )
- The ending, while poignant, could be further developed to provide a more definitive conclusion to Charlie's narrative arc and the central themes of the story. medium ( Scene 28 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - LATER) )
- The opening scene effectively introduces Charlie's character and the challenges he faces, setting up the central conflict and tone of the story. high ( Scene 2 (INT. - LIVING ROOM - DAY) )
- The brief scene with the pizza delivery boy, Danny, is a standout moment that humanizes Charlie and suggests the possibility of connection, even in his isolation. medium ( Scene 8 (INT. - FRONT DOORWAY - CONTINUOUS) )
- The scene where Charlie finds solace in the natural world, sticking his head out the window to breathe the fresh air, is a powerful moment that highlights his yearning for connection and freedom. medium ( Scene 14 (INT. - BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS) )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 8.25, The screenplay effectively establishes a compelling and clear premise of a conflicted overweight man Charlie seeking redemption by reconnecting with his daughter and confronting his health issues, aided by a young missionary Thomas. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the premise and its execution to captivate the audience and deepen its emotional impact. See More
Structure: 6.5, The screenplay exhibits strengths in crafting a compelling narrative with complex characters and a well-structured plot. However, there are areas that can be refined to enhance the overall storytelling dynamics, pacing, and character development. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay effectively explores profound themes of redemption, personal growth, and the complexities of human relationships. It delivers a compelling message about the importance of reconciliation, forgiveness, and the power of empathy. While the themes are clear and resonant, there are areas where they could be further refined to deepen the screenplay's overall thematic depth and impact. See More
Visual Impact: 9, The screenplay's visual imagery is vivid and impactful, creating a rich and immersive world for the reader. However, there are opportunities to enhance certain scenes and ensure visual consistency throughout. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.0, The screenplay effectively utilizes emotional moments to connect with the audience, particularly through the relatable struggles of the protagonist, Charlie. However, it has the potential to further enhance its emotional depth by introducing greater nuance and complexity to the characters' emotions and their relationships with each other. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict through its depiction of Charlie's physical and emotional struggles. However, the stakes could be further elevated to enhance tension and engagement. Focusing on the impact of Charlie's choices on his daughter, Ellie, and exploring the consequences of his actions can add depth to the conflict and heighten the stakes. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay exhibits a strong sense of originality and creativity, exploring sensitive themes with a unique narrative style and complex characters. It effectively combines elements of drama, family dynamics, and religious exploration to create a compelling and thought-provoking story. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Opening credits over black. Charlie, the narrator, expresses boredom and lack of understanding towards 'The Great Gatsby'. He asks for revisions on a paper and reminds students to submit paper four by Friday. The scene ends with a reminder to embrace revision.
- Charlie, a severely overweight man, is alone in his squalid apartment when he suddenly experiences chest pain. He tries to reach his phone but struggles. Thomas, a young man, enters and offers to call an ambulance. Charlie insists he doesn't go to hospitals and asks Thomas to read an essay on 'Moby Dick' instead. As Thomas reads, Charlie's pain begins to subside. Thomas tries to leave, but offers to call Charlie's friend, a nurse. Charlie asks for his phone and calls his friend. He explains that he wanted to hear the essay in case it was his last moments.
- Charlie, a severely overweight man, experiences chest pain and struggles to reach his phone. Thomas enters and offers to call an ambulance, but Charlie insists on Thomas reading an essay instead. As Thomas reads, Charlie's pain begins to subside. Charlie calls his friend and explains that he wanted to hear the essay in case it was his last moments.
- Charlie, a severely overweight and isolated man, experiences chest pain and struggles to take care of himself in his squalid apartment. He asks a young man named Thomas to read an essay on 'Moby Dick' to distract him from his pain. Charlie reflects on the book and draws parallels to his own life. The scene ends with Charlie feeling the weight of his choices and indulging in unhealthy habits.
- Charlie, a severely overweight man, experiences chest pain and searches for information on congestive heart failure. He becomes increasingly anxious and in pain, but eventually calms down.
- Charlie, a severely overweight man, tries to reconnect with his estranged daughter Ellie, but their conversation quickly turns confrontational. As Ellie reveals her resentment towards him for leaving, Charlie offers her money to help her with school. In a desperate attempt to prove himself, Charlie tries to stand up from the couch without assistance, but fails. Despite the failure, he still hopes to rebuild their relationship.
- Charlie receives a delivery from Gambino's and interacts with the delivery boy. He seems anxious and guilty about something related to his daughter, Ellie. After the delivery is made, Charlie watches the delivery boy leave and feels a sense of loneliness and regret.
- Charlie experiences chest pain and seeks help from Liz. They discuss Charlie's strained relationship with his daughter Ellie and his desire to reconnect with her. Liz is angry and concerned for Charlie's well-being. Charlie accidentally chokes on a piece of food and Liz saves him using the Heimlich Maneuver. Liz expresses her frustration with Charlie's choices and they attempt to move past the incident.
- Charlie, a severely overweight man, experiences chest pain and searches for information on congestive heart failure. He becomes increasingly anxious and in pain, but eventually calms down.
- Ellie and Charlie have a tense conversation about a poem. Charlie offers to write essays for Ellie, but she is dismissive. They discuss Ellie's mom and Charlie's past relationship. Ellie finds an old photo of Charlie and his deceased partner. Charlie reveals his partner's death as the reason for his weight gain. Ellie starts writing in a notebook given to her by Charlie.
- In the bathroom, Charlie struggles physically and emotionally. He braces himself on cinder blocks around the toilet and fights back tears. Ellie, his daughter, calls from outside but Charlie insists he's okay. He tries to calm himself down.
- Charlie's daughter Ellie lets Thomas, a man from New Life Church, into the house while Charlie is in the bathroom. Ellie engages in a tense and confrontational conversation with Thomas about religion and his assumptions. She takes a picture of him and tells him to come back tomorrow. Ellie leaves, leaving Charlie and Thomas alone.
- Charlie and Thomas have a tense conversation about religion and the end times. Charlie challenges Thomas's beliefs, expressing his dissatisfaction with the concept of God and the Bible. Liz enters and confronts Thomas, telling him to leave. She then presents a wheelchair to Charlie, who reluctantly tries it out and finds it surprisingly pleasant.
- Charlie enters his bedroom, struggles physically and emotionally, then has a tense conversation about religion with Thomas.
- Liz confronts Thomas about his missionary work and warns him to stay away from Charlie. She shares the story of her brother's tragic experience with the church. Charlie overhears the conversation and reveals himself in a wheelchair. Thomas leaves, and Liz tries to engage with Charlie but he remains withdrawn.
- Charlie has a tumultuous, emotional night filled with frustration and shame. He has a confrontational interaction with a delivery boy who shares his name. Afterwards, Charlie finds his daughter's notebook with negative remarks about him, but instead of feeling hurt, he finds humor in it. The scene transitions to shots of the Palouse landscape resembling ocean waves. The next day, Charlie speaks into a microphone, expressing his frustration with teaching and encourages honesty in writing.
- Charlie and Ellie have an intense and emotionally charged conversation about their relationship. Ellie expresses her anger towards Charlie for leaving her and her mother, while Charlie expresses his regret and tries to explain himself. They both reach a moment of understanding and connection. Ellie then offers to make Charlie a sandwich, showing a small act of kindness.
- Charlie is asleep in his wheelchair while Ellie smokes marijuana. Thomas arrives, and Ellie threatens to drug Charlie with more Ambien if he leaves. Ellie and Thomas smoke together and have a tense and awkward conversation. Ellie teases and taunts Thomas, who eventually realizes he is not a member of the church he claims to represent and leaves in a panic. Ellie confronts Thomas and locks him in Charlie's room, demanding answers.
- Thomas opens up about his past with the church, revealing his reasons for leaving and the repercussions he faced. Ellie listens and begins to understand Thomas better. Thomas discovers Charlie's connection to the church through a framed photo. He also realizes that Charlie is deeply invested in studying and interpreting the Bible.
- Ellie confronts Thomas about his true identity and locks him in Charlie's room. Thomas opens up about his past with the church. Liz and Mary arrive, discovering Charlie asleep in his wheelchair. They try to wake him up, while Ellie watches defiantly.
- Ellie and Charlie have a tense and emotionally charged conversation about their relationship. Ellie expresses anger towards Charlie for leaving her and her mother, while Charlie expresses regret and tries to explain himself. They both reach a moment of understanding and connection. Ellie threatens to drug Charlie if Thomas leaves, and they smoke together. Ellie confronts Thomas about his true identity and locks him in Charlie's room. Thomas opens up about his past with the church and discovers Charlie's connection to it. Liz and Mary arrive and are shocked by Charlie's deteriorating condition. Ellie refuses to give them money and Mary confronts her about the funds from Charlie's teaching being used for Ellie. Liz leaves in hurt and anger, and Ellie and Thomas are forced to leave as well. Charlie pleads with Ellie not to go and offers her a good essay he had written.
- Ellie steals an essay from Charlie and leaves the room. Mary confronts Charlie about their deal with Ellie and searches for alcohol. Charlie reflects on Ellie and their relationship. Mary opens up about her struggles and resentment towards Charlie. They discuss their roles in Ellie's life and Charlie expresses his desire to see her. Mary reveals that she doesn't blame him for his past actions. They have a tense but honest conversation about Ellie and their own mistakes.
- In this scene, Charlie confronts Mary about keeping Ellie away from him. Mary reveals that she sees Ellie as evil and is worried she will hurt Charlie. Charlie disagrees and insists that Ellie is just honest. Mary shows Charlie a hurtful caption on a photo of him on Ellie's Facebook page. They argue and discuss their past, with Mary admitting to feeling sorry for Alan, Charlie's friend. They both struggle with their emotions and share an intimate moment. Charlie reflects on a past family trip and the tension between them.
- Charlie and Mary have a tense conversation about Ellie and their relationship. Mary sees Ellie as evil and is worried about Charlie's well-being. Charlie expresses regret and wants to make sure Ellie is taken care of. Mary leaves in anger. Charlie reflects on his life and struggles with his health. He finds a crushed bird under a plate of bread crumbs, symbolizing loss.
- Charlie is alone in his apartment, feeling unwell and struggling with his emotions. He orders pizza but has difficulty opening the door when it is delivered. He eats the pizza angrily and writes a provocative post for his students. He searches for more food in his kitchen and experiences chest pain and nausea. He falls asleep in his wheelchair and is awakened by a knock at the door from Thomas.
- Charlie confronts Thomas about his parents finding out where he is. Thomas reveals how Ellie used photos and recordings to expose him. Charlie experiences chest pain and Thomas tries to offer help through religion. Charlie reflects on his past with Alan and expresses his self-hatred. The scene ends with Thomas leaving.
- Charlie reflects on his past and his relationship with Alan, expresses his self-hatred, and has a moment of honesty with his students before having an angry outburst.
- The scene focuses on the tense conversation between Charlie and Liz, where Liz expresses her anger and frustration at Charlie's actions. Charlie reflects on his past and his relationship with Alan, expressing self-hatred. Liz eventually decides to leave and calls for help, while Ellie enters the scene and shows concern for Charlie's well-being. Liz reluctantly agrees to leave them alone, and the scene ends with Liz breaking down and crying outside the apartment.
- Charlie confronts Ellie about a plagiarized essay, but reveals that he intentionally gave her an old essay of hers to test her. Ellie becomes emotional and reads the essay to Charlie, who is in physical pain. The scene ends with Charlie taking steps towards Ellie, symbolizing a moment of connection before the scene cuts to black.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Charlie | Charlie's character arc follows his journey to reconnect with his daughter Ellie and seek redemption for his past mistakes. Throughout the movie, he struggles with physical and emotional pain and reflects on his past actions. He begins as a critical and sarcastic narrator, who is isolated and struggling with an understanding of 'The Great Gatsby.' As the movie progresses, he faces a health scare that pushes him towards seeking information to cope with his anxiety and pain. He realizes his mistakes and longs for a relationship with his daughter, which leads him to plead for forgiveness and offer a gesture of kindness by giving Ellie his essay. He balances his regrets with a sense of positivity and empathy while also confronting his own past actions and mistakes. He manipulates Ellie to test her but also shows vulnerability and a desire for connection. The movie hints at a potential change or resolution for his character as he struggles with his own personal demons but shows a sense of determination. | While Charlie's character arc is well developed, there could be more emphasis on his growth and transformation throughout the movie. Charlie's manipulation of Ellie could be presented in a more nuanced and delicate way that can show his complexity but also his capacity for change and empathy. Additionally, there could be more exploration of his skepticism towards religion and his unresolved personal struggles. | The movie would benefit from presenting more positive moments for Charlie's character where he shows growth and transformation. The exploration of his skepticism towards religion and unresolved personal struggles could be better integrated into the plot to provide more depth to Charlie's character arc. Charlie's manipulation of Ellie could be presented in a more nuanced and delicate way, which can show his complexity and capacity for change and empathy. The movie would benefit from exploring how Charlie reconciles his skepticism towards religion with his desire for redemption and the complexity of his character development. |
Thomas | Thomas starts off as a representative of New Life Church, trying to convert others to his religion. Initially, he is portrayed as naive and easily influenced by the church's teachings. However, as the movie progresses, he starts to experience personal growth and begins to question his beliefs. He opens up about his difficult past with the church and starts to build connections with other characters, such as Ellie. Through his conversations with others, he starts to question his beliefs and realizes that there is more to life than just the teachings of his church. By the end of the movie, he has grown as a person and has started to separate himself from the more extreme beliefs of his church. | While Thomas's character arc is interesting and provides a unique perspective on religious belief, it could benefit from a clearer motivation. For example, why did Thomas initially join the church and what led him to start questioning his beliefs? Additionally, while Thomas's personal growth is well-executed, it feels slightly rushed and could have been more thoroughly developed throughout the movie. | To improve Thomas's character arc, consider adding more backstory about his life before joining the church. This could help explain his initial motivation and also provide context for his eventual disillusionment with the church. Additionally, try to develop Thomas's growth more gradually throughout the movie, rather than only exploring it in the final act. This could involve incorporating more scenes of Thomas questioning his beliefs and building connections with other characters, which would make his personal growth feel more earned and satisfying. |
CHARLIE | Charlie begins the movie experiencing chest pain and refusing medical help, highlighting his reluctance to confront his health issues. However, his desire to reconnect with his estranged daughter, Ellie, drives him to take action and begin the process of losing weight and improving his health. Throughout the movie, Charlie faces many obstacles, both physical and emotional, but he does not give up on his goal of redeeming himself and rebuilding his relationship with Ellie. Ultimately, he succeeds in losing weight and regaining some mobility with a wheelchair. Charlie reflects on his past mistakes and values the power of honesty in writing to help him move forward and connect with his daughter again. | The character of Charlie is well-developed and has clear motivations. However, his arc could be more nuanced and complex. While his weight loss journey is inspiring, his portrayal as solely seeking redemption through his weight loss and relationship with his daughter limits the potential depth and complexity of his character. | To improve Charlie's character arc, the screenplay could explore the underlying reasons for his weight gain and explore his character beyond his relationship with Ellie. Additionally, adding more internal conflict and emotional turmoil would add complexity and depth to his character's arc. |
THOMAS | Thomas starts as a well-meaning missionary, eager to help Charlie. However, as he becomes more involved in the group, he grapples with his personal demons. He feels conflicted between his faith, doubts, and sexuality. This leads to him acting out and causing tension within the group. Ultimately, he confronts his demons and decides to leave the church and embrace his sexuality, ending as a more accepting and self-assured person. | The character arc is interesting and thought-provoking, but it would benefit from more development. Thomas's struggles with his faith, doubts, and sexuality are complex, and the film could explore these themes in greater depth. | To improve the character arc, the film could add more scenes that delve into Thomas's internal struggles. For example, it would be interesting to see him grappling with his beliefs and how they clash with his desires. Additionally, the film could show the fallout of his excommunication from the church, and how this affects his relationships with his family and friends. |
Ellie | Ellie's character arc begins with her as an angry and resentful daughter who blames her father for their broken family. As the movie progresses, Ellie confronts her own biases and assumptions, challenging societal norms and Thomas's religious beliefs. She learns to empathize with her father's perspective and shows moments of vulnerability and kindness towards him. Ellie begins to see the potential for growth and change in herself and starts to step out of her comfort zone, taking on more responsibility and caring for Charlie. In the end, Ellie reads her essay to Charlie and shows a brief moment of connection, signaling her potential for forgiveness and healing. | The character arc for Ellie is well-written and explores her internal struggles and growth throughout the movie. However, there are moments where her character's actions and behaviors feel inconsistent and could use more development. | To improve Ellie's character arc, the screenplay could delve deeper into her motivations and emotions, giving the audience a stronger understanding of her inner conflicts. Additionally, her actions and behaviors could be more consistent throughout the movie, with her growth and development more clearly demonstrated in each scene. Overall, Ellie's character arc is strong, but could benefit from further development and consistency. |
Liz | Liz begins as a concerned and angry woman trying to help Charlie. She transforms into a strong and supportive friend who defends him against his enemies. However, her loyalty is tested when she discovers Ellie's betrayal and the extent of Charlie's wrongdoing. She ultimately makes the difficult decision to call for help and say farewell to Charlie. | The character arc for Liz is interesting and presents some compelling challenges for the character. However, the transitions between each stage of her arc could be smoother, as it feels abrupt at times. Additionally, Liz's motivations and inner conflict could be further developed to create a deeper and more nuanced character. | To improve the character arc for Liz, consider adding more scenes that delve into her emotional journey and explore her motivations for each decision she makes. This could help create a more well-rounded and complex character. Additionally, consider adding more moments of hesitation or self-doubt for Liz, as she often feels too confident and assured in her decisions. |
Mary | Throughout the movie, Mary's character arc is focused on facing and overcoming her own insecurities and fears. She starts off resentful towards Ellie and initially expresses anger and resentment towards Charlie. However, as the story progresses, Mary begins to acknowledge her own mistakes and reflect on her relationship with her daughter and Charlie. She confronts Ellie about the money from Charlie's teaching and shows a protective side towards him. Towards the end of the movie, Mary reveals her struggles and shows empathy towards Charlie. She comes to a realization that she needs to let go of her resentment towards Ellie and try to mend their relationship. | The character arc for Mary feels rushed and could benefit from more development throughout the movie. It is also lacking in specificity, with some parts unclear or underdeveloped. The transition from being resentful towards Ellie to showing empathy towards Charlie could also be smoother. | To improve Mary's character arc, the movie could focus on delving deeper into her past regrets and insecurities that have caused her guarded nature and resentful attitude towards Ellie. The transition towards empathy for Charlie could be smoothed over by showing more specific moments of reflection and self-realization, rather than it seeming to happen suddenly. Additionally, more scenes that explore Mary and Ellie's relationship could really help give the audience a deeper sense of their complicated dynamic. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation |
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Mortality | The screenplay explores the theme of mortality through Charlie's severe chest pain and his desire to hear an essay as if it were his last moments. | The theme of mortality is present as Charlie confronts his own mortality through his physical pain and struggles to connect with his daughter before it's too late. |
Isolation | The screenplay touches on the theme of isolation through Charlie's squalid apartment and his struggles to reach out for help. | Isolation is a theme as Charlie experiences physical and emotional distress in his apartment and is largely alone in his struggles. |
Desire for connection | The screenplay explores the theme of the desire for connection through Charlie's interactions with Thomas and his attempts to reconnect with his estranged daughter Ellie. | The theme of the desire for connection is present as Charlie seeks companionship, both through his interactions with Thomas and his attempt to repair his relationship with Ellie. |
Regret | The screenplay delves into the theme of regret through Charlie's reflection on his past actions and his strained relationship with his daughter Ellie. | Regret is explored as Charlie reflects on the consequences of his past choices, particularly in his relationship with Ellie, and tries to make amends. |
Family | The screenplay explores the theme of family through the strained relationship between Charlie and his daughter Ellie. | The theme of family is present as Charlie and Ellie struggle to reconnect and understand each other, reflecting the complexities and tensions within their relationship. |
Religion | The screenplay touches on the theme of religion through Thomas's affiliation with New Life Church and his discussions with Ellie. | Religion is a theme as Thomas's presence and discussions with Ellie revolve around their differing beliefs and the impact of religion on their lives. |
Doubt | The screenplay explores the theme of doubt through Thomas's questioning of his beliefs and experiences with the church. | Doubt is present as Thomas shares his doubts about the church and its practices, leading to a crisis of faith and self-discovery. |
Weight and physical health | The screenplay touches on the theme of weight and physical health through Charlie's struggle with severe chest pain and the impact of his weight on his daily life. | The theme of weight and physical health is present as Charlie's weight and health issues contribute to his physical and emotional struggles throughout the screenplay. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolved throughout the script, ranging from seeking meaningful and engaging literature to finding comfort and connection in relationships. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals evolved throughout the script, ranging from academic assignments and deadlines to seeking medical help and emotional support. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay is the clash of beliefs and values surrounding religion, personal beliefs, and existential concepts. The characters grapple with questions of faith, purpose, morality, and the search for meaning. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's evolving internal and external goals contribute to their emotional, psychological, and moral growth throughout the script. As they confront challenges and conflicts, they grapple with their beliefs, values, and personal transformations. The goals reflect their desires, fears, and deeper yearnings, allowing for a nuanced and layered portrayal of the character's development.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The evolving internal and external goals of the protagonist create a dynamic narrative structure, driving the plot forward and providing a trajectory for the character's journey. The goals provide a sense of direction and purpose to the story, as the protagonist navigates challenges, conflicts, and transformations. The narrative structure is shaped by the protagonist's pursuit of their goals, creating a cohesive and coherent storyline.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring existential questions, morality, identity, family dynamics, and the human experience. The protagonist's internal and external goals provide a lens through which these themes are explored, offering a deeper understanding of the complexities of life, relationships, and personal growth. The goals and conflicts enhance the thematic exploration, creating a rich and thought-provoking narrative.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - The Whale | Critical, Sarcastic, Serious | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 2 | 8 | 6 | 2 | 4 | 3 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 8 | |
2 - Charlie's Health Scare | Boredom, Confusion, Panic, Awkwardness, Tentative | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
3 - A Life in Limbo | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | ||
4 - The Lonely Night | Somber, Reflective, Regretful, Desperate | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
5 - Health Scare | 7 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | ||
6 - A Fractured Reunion | tense, emotional, confrontational, heartbreaking | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | |
7 - Delivery Boy Interlude | Anxious, Lonely, Guilty, Desperate | 8 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
8 - A Desperate Reconnection | Anxious, Tense, Regretful, Angry | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | |
9 - Charlie's Desperation | 5 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 3 | 5 | 4 | 5 | 3 | 4 | 4 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | ||
10 - Reconnecting Through Literature | Confrontational, Anxious, Regretful, Resentful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
11 - Charlie's Bathroom Breakdown | Anxious, Lonely, Regretful | 8 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
12 - Awkward Encounter | Tense, Awkward, Confrontational | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | |
13 - Confrontation and Revelation | tense, emotional, confrontational | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
14 - Charlie's Struggle | Tense, Confrontational, Emotional | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | |
15 - A Clash of Beliefs | Tense, Confrontational, Angry, Sad | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
16 - Charlie's Reflection | Tense, Confrontational, Emotional, Regretful, Reflective, Hopeful | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
17 - Father and Daughter | tense, emotional | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
18 - Ambien Sandwiches | Tense, Emotional, Sarcastic, Intense | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
19 - Revelations and Confessions | Intense, Emotional, Tense, Awkward | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
20 - Revelations and Reconciliation | Intense, Emotional, Tense, Awkward | 8 | 7 | 8 | 4 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 8 | |
21 - Revelations and Betrayals | Intense, Emotional, Tense, Awkward | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
22 - Reconciliation and Regret | Tense, Awkward, Sad | 8 | 7 | 6 | 4 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 4 | 5 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
23 - Confrontation and Reconciliation | tense, emotional, honest | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Reconciliation and Loss | Tense, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
25 - Tension and Reflection | Tense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
26 - Revelations and Pain | Tense, Emotional, Intense | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
27 - Friday | Tense, Emotional, Reflective | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
28 - Confrontation and Farewell | Tense, Emotional, Defeated, Hopeful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
29 - The Final Revelation | tense, emotional, confrontational | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Strong emotional impact, well-developed characters, exploration of themes
- Effective tension-building, emotionally engaging dialogue, authentic character interactions
- Strong atmosphere and emotion, intriguing protagonist, exploration of themes
- Strong portrayal of Charlie's emotions and inner turmoil, effective use of silence and visual cues to enhance the atmosphere, establishes themes of regret and loneliness
- Tense and emotional dialogue, well-developed characters, tragic backstory adds depth
Scene Weaknesses
- Lacks significant plot development, low conflict level
- Limited development of secondary characters, some repetitive dialogue
- Lack of character and emotional depth, limited conflict and dialogue impact
- Dialogue could be more nuanced, lacks significant plot development
- Limited external conflict or high-action moments
Suggestions
- Consider increasing the conflict level and plot development to engage the audience more
- Explore secondary characters in more depth and vary the dialogue for more impact
- Develop more emotional depth and nuance in the dialogue and character interactions
- Work on creating more external conflict or high-action moments to keep the audience engaged
- Use visual descriptions to enhance the setting and offer more complexity to the characters
- Physical environment: The world depicted in the script is primarily domestic settings such as living rooms, bedrooms, bathrooms, and hallways. Some locations include a college or university, an apartment, and the Palouse region of northwestern Idaho. The physical environments vary from cluttered and squalid spaces to typical domestic settings. The Palouse region is characterized by rolling crop fields resembling ocean waves.
- Culture: Cultural elements in the screenplay are touched upon but not explicitly portrayed. However, there are references to academic settings, religious beliefs, strained family relationships, and societal expectations.
- Society: The societal structures are not explicitly shown or mentioned, but there are hints of family dynamics and tensions. There are also mentions of academic rigor and the influence of religious beliefs.
- Technology: Technological aspects are present in the form of laptops, computers, cellphones, and the internet. These technologies are used for academic purposes, communication, and research.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environments, cultural elements, societal structures, and technological aspects shape the characters' experiences and actions. The squalid apartment and physical limitations of the protagonist, Charlie, contribute to his sense of despair, isolation, and struggles with health issues. The academic setting influences his perspective on literature. The tension in family dynamics and religious beliefs affect the characters' interactions and decisions. Technological devices impact communication and research.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements help establish the atmosphere and setting of each scene, contributing to the overall narrative. The physical environments create a sense of desolation, decay, and confinement, reflecting the characters' emotional state. The cultural elements and societal structures provide context and conflicts for the characters, driving the plot forward. Technology serves as a tool for communication, research, and storytelling.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay deepen the thematic exploration of mortality, isolation, family dynamics, regret, religious identity, and the desire for connection. The physical environments and societal pressures contribute to the characters' internal struggles and personal growth. The cultural elements and technological aspects highlight the themes of modernity, authenticity, and the impact of external influences on individuals' lives.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's original voice throughout the screenplay is characterized by raw and emotional dialogue, introspective moments, and concise narrative descriptions. The dialogue often reflects the characters' internal struggles and conflicts, while the narrative descriptions provide subtle but evocative details of the characters' actions and emotions. The writer's voice contributes to the overall mood, themes, and depth of the screenplay by creating a sense of authenticity and emotional intensity. It allows the audience to empathize with the characters' struggles and adds layers of meaning to their interactions. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of realism and emotional depth. The raw and emotional dialogue allows the characters' true emotions to shine through, while the introspective moments provide insights into their inner thoughts and struggles. The concise narrative descriptions enhance the visual and emotional impact of the scenes, creating a nuanced and immersive experience for the audience. The writer's voice also explores themes of family dynamics, personal growth, redemption, and the complexity of human relationships, adding depth and complexity to the overall narrative. |
Best Representation Scene | 27 - Friday |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene could serve as the encapsulation of the writer's unique voice in the screenplay because it effectively conveys the intense emotions and inner conflicts of the characters through raw and honest dialogue. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Tone and Emotional Impact | There is a strong positive correlation between the tone and emotional impact of the scenes. Scenes with a higher emotional impact tend to have a more intense or emotional tone. |
Character Changes and Emotional Impact | Scenes with higher emotional impact also tend to have more significant character changes. This suggests that the emotional impact of a scene has a direct impact on the development and growth of the characters. |
Conflict and High Stakes | Scenes with a higher level of conflict also tend to have higher stakes. This implies that the conflicts faced by the characters are directly related to the importance and consequences of their actions. |
Dialogue and Tone | There is a moderate positive correlation between the dialogue and tone of the scenes. Scenes with a more serious or intense tone tend to have more impactful and meaningful dialogue. |
Overall Grade and Emotional Impact | Scenes with a higher emotional impact generally receive higher overall grades. This suggests that the emotional engagement of the audience plays a significant role in determining the quality of the scene. |
Concept and Plot | There is a strong positive correlation between the concept and plot of the scenes. Scenes with a more intriguing or unique concept tend to have a more developed and engaging plot. |
Tone and Conflict | Scenes with a higher level of conflict tend to have a more tense or intense tone. This indicates that the conflicts faced by the characters contribute to the overall atmosphere and mood of the scene. |
Dialogue and Character Changes | Scenes with more significant character changes tend to have more impactful and meaningful dialogue. This suggests that the growth and development of the characters are reflected in their interactions and conversations. |
Tone and Character Changes | Scenes with more significant character changes tend to have a more emotional or reflective tone. This implies that the personal transformations of the characters evoke strong emotions and introspection. |
Conflict and Move Story Forward | Scenes with a higher level of conflict have a stronger impact on moving the story forward. This indicates that conflicts serve as catalysts for progression and development within the narrative. |
Dialogue and Emotional Impact | Scenes with more impactful and emotional dialogue tend to have a higher emotional impact. This suggests that the words and conversations exchanged between characters have the power to evoke strong emotions in the audience. |
Dialogue and Conflict | Scenes with a higher level of conflict tend to have more intense and confrontational dialogue. This indicates that conflicting interests often lead to heated and emotionally charged conversations. |
Character Changes and Stakes | Scenes with more significant character changes tend to have higher stakes. This implies that the personal growth and transformations of the characters directly impact the risks and consequences they face. |
Dialogue and Characters | There is a weak positive correlation between the dialogue and characters of the scenes. Scenes with more developed and engaging characters tend to have more compelling and meaningful dialogue. |
Emotional Impact and High Stakes | Scenes with a higher emotional impact also tend to have higher stakes. This suggests that the intensity of emotions experienced by the characters is closely tied to the importance and consequences of their actions. |
Conflict and Stakes | Scenes with a higher level of conflict tend to have higher stakes. This indicates that conflicts are often driven by high-risk situations that have significant consequences for the characters. |
Tone and High Stakes | Scenes with higher stakes generally have a more intense or serious tone. This implies that the level of risk and importance within a scene shapes its overall atmosphere and mood. |
Tone and Move Story Forward | Scenes that effectively move the story forward often have a more intense or action-driven tone. This suggests that progression within the narrative is often accompanied by heightened tension and excitement. |
Character Changes and Conflict | Scenes with more significant character changes often involve a higher level of conflict. This implies that personal growth and transformations of the characters are often triggered or challenged by conflicts. |
Dialogue and Emotional Impact | Scenes with more impactful and emotional dialogue tend to have a higher emotional impact. This suggests that the words and conversations exchanged between characters have the power to evoke strong emotions in the audience. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Opening Monologue | The screenplay begins with Charlie, the narrator, sharing their negative opinion of 'The Great Gatsby' and expressing disappointment in a paper they received. | An opening monologue is a trope where a character directly addresses the audience or provides exposition at the beginning of a story. This trope serves to set the tone and provide insight into the character's perspective. An example of this trope can be found in the TV show 'Fleabag,' where the main character often breaks the fourth wall to deliver monologues to the audience. |
Protagonist In Distress | Charlie, a severely overweight man, experiences chest pain and struggles to reach his phone. He asks for assistance and later reveals that he wanted to hear the essay in case it was his last moments. | Protagonist in distress is a trope where the main character faces physical or emotional challenges that put them in a vulnerable position. This trope creates tension and allows for character development. An example of this trope can be found in the movie 'Cast Away,' where the protagonist, played by Tom Hanks, is stranded on a deserted island and faces various challenges that test his survival skills. |
Motif of Mortality | The scenes explore themes of mortality, isolation, and the desire for connection. Charlie experiences chest pain and reflects on his life choices. | Motif of mortality is a trope where the theme of death or the fear of death is explored throughout the story. This trope adds depth and allows for introspection of the characters. An example of this trope can be found in the TV show 'Six Feet Under,' where each episode begins with a death and explores the impact of mortality on the characters' lives. |
Father-Daughter Conflict | Charlie struggles to reconnect with his estranged daughter Ellie, and they have tense conversations about their past and relationship. | Father-daughter conflict is a trope where there is tension, disagreement, or a breakdown in the relationship between a father and daughter. This trope often explores themes of family, regret, and the desire for reconciliation. An example of this trope can be found in the movie 'Lady Bird,' where the main character has a strained relationship with her mother and seeks validation from her distant father. |
Anxiety Attack | Charlie experiences chest pain and searches online for information on congestive heart failure, becoming increasingly anxious and in pain. He eventually calms himself down. | Anxiety attack is a trope where a character experiences intense anxiety or panic, often accompanied by physical symptoms. This trope creates tension and allows for exploration of the character's mental state. An example of this trope can be found in the TV show 'Mr. Robot,' where the protagonist frequently experiences anxiety attacks and struggles with his mental health. |
Tense Confrontation | There are multiple scenes depicting tense confrontations between characters, such as Charlie and Ellie, Charlie and Thomas, Charlie and Liz, and Charlie and Mary. | Tense confrontation is a trope where characters engage in heated arguments or confrontations that are filled with tension and emotion. This trope often reveals conflicts, motivations, and allows for character development. An example of this trope can be found in the movie 'A Few Good Men,' where the courtroom scenes are filled with intense confrontations between the lawyers and witnesses. |
Redemption Through Connection | There are moments of connection and reconciliation between Charlie and Ellie, Charlie and Liz, and Charlie and Mary, where they reach a deeper understanding of each other and attempt to reconcile past mistakes. | Redemption through connection is a trope where characters are able to find redemption or healing through connecting with others. This trope often explores the power of forgiveness, empathy, and human connection. An example of this trope can be found in the movie 'The Shawshank Redemption,' where the main character finds redemption and a sense of belonging through his friendship with another inmate. |
Emotional Breakthrough | Characters have emotional breakthroughs in various scenes, such as Liz breaking down emotionally outside the apartment, Charlie reflecting on his life, and Mary opening up about her struggles and resentment. | Emotional breakthrough is a trope where characters experience a significant shift in their emotions or a releasing of pent-up feelings. This trope often leads to character growth, catharsis, and a deeper understanding of themselves or others. An example of this trope can be found in the movie 'Good Will Hunting,' where the main character has a breakthrough moment with his therapist, leading to a breakthrough in his emotional development. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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3 | LIZ: You say you’re sorry one more time I’m gonna shove a knife right into you, I swear to God-- |
6 | Ellie: Just being around you is disgusting. You smell disgusting. Your apartment is disgusting. You look disgusting. The last time I saw you, you were disgusting. |
8 | LIZ: GODDAMMIT CHARLIE, WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU? |
18 | Ellie: If you don’t take a hit I’m gonna call the police and tell them you tried to rape me. |
21 | Ellie: Just fucking die already. |
Some Loglines to consider:
A severely overweight man experiences chest pain and seeks comfort through literature as he navigates his own mortality. |
A tense and emotional scene explores the strained relationship between a severely overweight man and his estranged daughter, highlighting themes of family and regret. |
A man in physical and emotional distress finds solace in hearing an essay read aloud to him, contemplating his life choices and desires for connection. |
A severely overweight man battles physical and emotional pain in a squalid apartment, finding fleeting moments of relief through literature and reflection. |
A man's search for understanding and connection through literature and reflection is juxtaposed with his physical pain and struggle, exploring themes of mortality, isolation, and the desire for meaning. |
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