Sense8
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
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USP: This script offers a groundbreaking blend of supernatural and crime genres, exploring themes of interconnectedness, identity, and redemption through a unique ensemble of characters. With its vivid sensory storytelling, authentic dialogue, and poetic introspection, the script delves deep into the emotional struggles and growth of its protagonists, offering a fresh and captivating narrative experience. The innovative storytelling techniques, diverse representation, and thought-provoking themes set this script apart, making it a compelling and unforgettable piece of storytelling.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Thriller, Crime, Mystery, Comedy, Romance, Fantasy, Action, Medical
Setting: Contemporary, Multiple locations including Chicago, San Francisco, Berlin, Mumbai, Nairobi, and Seoul
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates strong character development, engaging dialogue, and creative storytelling techniques. While it excels in unpredictability and emotional depth, there are opportunities to enhance pacing, resolution satisfaction, and character nuances.
Themes: Connections and Empathy, Identity and Self-Acceptance, Violence and Loss
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts include the sense8s' struggle to connect with each other and resist their enemy, Mr. Whispers, who wants to take them away. Each sense8 also has their own personal conflicts, such as Will's internal struggle with his sensory overload and the aftermath of his actions, Kala's internal conflict about her marriage, and Nomi's struggle with her identity and acceptance.
Overall Mood: Emotional, intense, and thought-provoking
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: Emotional and intense as Angel struggles to connect the cluster and ultimately kills herself.
- Scene 2: Tense and urgent as Will searches for the blond girl/angel and ultimately witnesses her suicide.
- Scene 3: Discomfort and distress as Will grapples with his sensory overload and the guilt from his actions.
- Scene 4: Serious and professional as Sun tries to find the source of the music that's causing her migraine.
- Scene 5: Tense and dramatic as Lito struggles with his behavior and drug use on the telenovela set.
- Scene 6: Sensual and intimate as Lito struggles with his arousal and Nomi and Amanita have post-coital moment.
- Scene 7: Light-hearted and joyful as Kala's friends sing an Indian love song and celebrate her future.
- Scene 8: Emotional and introspective as Kala prays to Ganesha for help in falling in love with her fiancé.
- Scene 9: Somber and reflective as Sun visits her father's office and experiences a sudden change in environment.
- Scene 10: Comforting and reassuring as Capheus' godmother explains the significance of his vision and encourages him to embrace his destiny.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The unique blend of science fiction, action, and drama with a diverse cast and innovative ideas.
- Plot Twist : The complex narrative and large cast create unexpected twists and turns that keep audiences engaged.
- Distinctive Settings : The distinctive settings in multiple locations around the world create a visually stunning and immersive experience for audiences.
- Genre Blends : The unique blend of genres, including science fiction, action, and drama, create a compelling and engaging storyline.
- Unique Characters : The unique and diverse cast of characters, each with their own personal conflicts and struggles, create a relatable and engaging storyline.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$50-100 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-49, fans of science fiction, action, and drama.
Marketability: The unique blend of genres and exploration of compelling themes with a diverse cast make this screenplay appealing to a wide audience. However, the complex narrative and large cast may make it challenging to market.
The innovative ideas and unique characters in this screenplay make it stand out from other science fiction and action films. However, the niche themes and unconventional storytelling may limit its appeal to some audiences.
The distinctive settings and genre blends in this screenplay create a visually stunning and immersive experience for audiences. The strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations also make it highly marketable.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations.
Scene Level Percentiles
Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay has a high emotional impact (82.59%ile) and originality score (92.86%ile), suggesting a strong emotional core and unique storyline.
- The writer excels in character changes (76.83%ile), indicating well-developed characters that grow throughout the story.
- The screenplay has a high engagement score (88.39%ile), implying that it keeps readers invested in the story.
- Plot development needs focus (14.73%ile), specifically working on raising the stakes (47.59%ile) and improving story forwardness (30.49%ile).
- The writer can enhance conflict levels (31.25%ile) to create more tension and drama.
- Structure score (2.68%ile) is significantly lower, suggesting a reevaluation of the story's structure and pacing.
The writer's style appears to be more intuitive, with higher dialogue, character development, and emotional impact percentiles.
Balancing Elements- Improve plot development, structure, and pacing to balance the strong character changes and emotional impact.
- Increase conflict levels to create a more engaging and suspenseful narrative.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has a unique storyline and engaging characters, but it requires improvement in plot development, structure, and pacing to reach its full potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Script Theme | 9.25 | 96 | Enemy of the State: 9.00 | Breaking Bad: 9.25 |
Script Visual Impact | 8.75 | 91 | Deep Cover: 8.50 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.75 |
Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 76 | Almost Famous: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 8.1 | 73 | Cruel Intentions: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
Scene Originality | 8.83 | 63 | The usual suspects: 8.82 | Shaun of the Dead: 8.83 |
Scene Character Changes | 7.0 | 59 | Zootopia: 6.9 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.0 |
Script Structure | 8.00 | 47 | Swingers: 7.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.00 |
Scene Pacing | 8.29 | 46 | Knives Out: 8.27 | a few good men: 8.29 |
Script Emotional Impact | 7.75 | 46 | Inception: 7.50 | Erin Brokovich: 7.75 |
Scene Characters | 8.2 | 45 | Hot Fuzz: 8.1 | face/off: 8.2 |
Script Characters | 8.25 | 45 | The Hudsucker Proxy: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.3 | 40 | Elvis: 7.2 | severance (TV): 7.3 |
Scene Concept | 8.0 | 39 | Poor Things: 7.9 | a few good men: 8.0 |
Overall Script | 8.00 | 39 | Mo: 7.90 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.36 | 35 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.35 | Mo: 7.36 |
Scene Overall | 8.2 | 34 | Almost Famous: 8.1 | a few good men: 8.2 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.3 | 33 | Beetlejuice: 7.2 | Back to the future: 7.3 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 27 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Plot | 7.6 | 26 | Birdman: 7.5 | severance (TV): 7.6 |
Script Premise | 7.50 | 24 | Zootopia: 7.25 | fight Club: 7.50 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.4 | 23 | Inside Out: 7.3 | face/off: 7.4 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.6 | 22 | Almost Famous: 7.5 | Rear Window: 7.6 |
Scene External Goal | 7.05 | 19 | Killers of the flower moon: 7.04 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.05 |
Script Originality | 7.75 | 19 | Cruel Intentions: 7.50 | Terminator 2: 7.75 |
Scene Formatting | 7.93 | 7 | Psycho: 7.90 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 7.93 |
Script Conflict | 7.00 | 6 | 500 days of summer: 6.75 | Breaking Bad: 7.00 |
Script Structure | 7.95 | 2 | Wild Wild West: 7.93 | The shining: 7.95 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of emotional depth, introspection, and vivid imagery. The dialogue is poetic, reflective, and filled with tension, while the narrative descriptions are atmospheric and evocative.
Best representation: Scene 13 - A Migraine Amidst Rivals: Wolfgang's Contemplation at Yuri Hassan's Funeral. This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's poetic language, introspective tone, and focus on emotional depth and spiritual themes. The dialogue and narrative style effectively capture the writer's unique voice and storytelling approach.
Memorable Lines:
- Angel: I... see them... (Scene 1)
- Nocker: I rocked them, in me arms. Never done nufink like that neither and no one said nufink. (Scene 4)
- LITO: I've come to blow your fuckin brains out. (Scene 5)
- Nomi: I knew I was going to marry you. (Scene 31)
- YUEN TAN-WU: Your nose is too big and tits are too small. (Scene 10)
Writing Style:
The writing style across this screenplay is characterized by a blend of intense emotional drama, complex character psychology, and nonlinear narrative structure. The scenes incorporate surreal elements, supernatural phenomena, and philosophical themes, often with a dark and gritty atmosphere. The dialogue is sharp, witty, and intense, building tension through character interactions and exploring moral dilemmas.
Style Similarities:
- David Fincher
- Quentin Tarantino
- Charlie Kaufman
- Christopher Nolan
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Consider
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Sense8' presents a compelling and ambitious narrative that explores the interconnected lives of a diverse ensemble of characters from around the world. The screenplay's strengths lie in its effective use of sensory experiences to link the characters, as well as its exploration of cultural and social themes. However, the pacing and character development could be tightened in places, and the overall narrative could benefit from increased clarity around the central mystery or driving force. With some refinement, this screenplay has the potential to be a captivating and thought-provoking feature film.
- The screenplay effectively establishes the interconnectedness of the main characters through the shared sensory experiences. This narrative device creates a compelling sense of unity and mystery around the characters' abilities. high ( Scene 25 (Multiple Scenes) )
- The screenplay provides insight into the cultural and familial contexts of several characters, adding depth and nuance to their motivations and decision-making. medium ( Scene 8 (Ganesha's Temple) Scene 10 (Bak Industries) )
- The screenplay addresses timely social and political themes around identity, marginalization, and the importance of community, demonstrating a strong thematic core. medium ( Scene 27 (Pride Festival) )
- The screenplay could benefit from tighter pacing and more consistent character perspectives in the opening sequences, as the transitions between the various storylines can feel abrupt at times. medium ( Scene 1 (Burned Out Apartment) Scene 32 (Burned Out Apartment) )
- While the character of Will is well-developed, his storyline feels somewhat disconnected from the broader narrative, and could benefit from stronger integration with the other characters. medium ( Scene 16 (South Side Street) Scene 18 (Abandoned Building) )
- The screenplay could benefit from more consistent character development and backstories, particularly for the supporting characters. Some characters feel more like archetypes than fully realized individuals. medium ( Scene )
- The overall narrative could be strengthened by providing more clarity around the central mystery or driving force that connects the various storylines and characters. medium ( Scene )
- The screenplay effectively utilizes sound design and sensory elements to create a visceral, immersive experience for the audience, blurring the lines between the characters' individual realities. high ( Scene 24 (Multiple Scenes) )
- The screenplay explores themes of morality, spirituality, and the weight of family legacy, providing nuanced perspectives on these complex issues. medium ( Scene 5 (Church) Scene 14 (Cemetery) )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.5, The screenplay's premise has a captivating hook and intriguing characters, setting up a narrative with potential for suspense and exploration of identity, connection, and empowerment. However, some refinement in terms of clarity and originality could enhance its overall impact and audience engagement. See More
Structure: 8.0, The screenplay effectively intertwines multiple storylines and compelling characters, creating a captivating narrative. However, certain aspects of the plot structure and pacing could be refined for smoother transitions and heightened impact. See More
Theme: 9.25, The screenplay explores profound themes of identity, connection, and the human condition through a diverse cast of characters facing personal struggles and societal complexities. It effectively conveys its messages about empathy, acceptance, and the search for purpose, offering a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant narrative. See More
Visual Impact: 8.75, The screenplay exhibits a strong foundation for visual storytelling, employing vivid imagery and creative visual approaches that enhance the narrative and emotional impact. The screenplay's visuals effectively set the tone, immerse the audience, and drive the story forward. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.75, This screenplay possesses strong emotional foundations and presents ample opportunities for enhancing its emotional depth and connection with the audience. It effectively captures a range of emotions, from intimacy and vulnerability to uncertainty and pain. However, there are areas where the emotional impact could be amplified and the complexity of character experiences explored further to create a more profound and enduring emotional resonance. See More
Conflict: 7.0, The screenplay effectively leverages conflict and stakes to engage the audience. However, there are opportunities to further elevate the narrative tension and stakes, particularly through sharpening the clarity and weaving in more personal consequences for the characters. See More
Originality: 7.75, The screenplay's originality and creativity lie in its ability to weave together seemingly disparate storylines with a diverse ensemble of characters, each of whom grapples with internal and external conflicts. The narrative explores complex themes of identity, societal expectations, and the search for connection in a world fraught with challenges. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- In a burnt-out apartment, Angel, a sense8, lies barely alive, giving birth to a new cluster. Jonas, another sense8, appears to help her through the process, while Mr. Whispers, their enemy, inspects Angel. Facing an internal conflict, Angel ultimately kills herself to prevent Mr. Whispers from taking her away. The scene is emotional and intense, filled with dialogue that highlights the conflict between the characters and the visual elements of the burnt-out apartment and the mirror flash revealing different characters around the world.
- In a tense and urgent scene, a young boy named Will runs through the woods at night, searching for a blond girl who keeps appearing and disappearing. She leads him to an abandoned hospital, where Will hides and observes the girl in a cage in a well-appointed lab. Years later, the adult Will finds himself in the same setting, witnessing the blond girl, now an angel, holding a gun and putting it in her mouth. Despite his attempts to help, she pulls the trigger, and adult Will can only shout 'No!' in despair.
- Will, the main character, wakes up from a nightmare, drenched in sweat and experiencing a sensory overload. The hot alley smell, loud music, and a migraine with the bass intensify his discomfort. He goes to the bathroom, cools himself with water, takes some Advil, and leaves his apartment with his police badge. The scene takes place at night, inside Will's hot and noisy apartment, with a party going on in the next apartment and an open window letting in the stench from the alley. The main conflict is Will's internal struggle with his sensory overload and the aftermath of his actions in the previous scene. The emotional tone is one of discomfort and distress, as Will grapples with his internal conflict and the guilt from his actions. There is no dialogue in this scene, as Will's actions and internal struggles are the main focus.
- In this scene, Will tries to find the source of the music causing his migraine and enters an empty apartment. He then talks to an old man in the hallway who also heard the music. Meanwhile, in London, Riley listens to the same music with her boyfriend Jacks and their friends in a cab. They discuss Nocker's story about his sister's daughters who sensed their mother's distress while she was in labor. The main conflict is Will's frustration to find the source of the music, while the tone is serious in the hallway and lighthearted in the cab. The scene ends with Will and the old man's conversation and Riley and her friends continuing their conversation in the cab.
- Lito, a telenovela actor, is filming a scene where he is about to shoot a priest in a church. However, the entrance of a nun who declares her love for him causes a conflict in Lito's actions. The director, noticing Lito's behavior, confronts him about his drug use, leading to further conflict. The scene is revealed to be a film set, and the director gives Lito a break and plans to set up for a close-up shot.
- In this sensual and humorous scene, Lito, a screenwriter, deals with his arousal-induced distraction, while Nomi and Amanita enjoy a post-coital moment in their San Francisco apartment. Lito's personal conflict of focusing on work is heightened by his current state, while Nomi and Amanita's moment is interrupted by a knock on the door. The scene concludes with Amanita leaving Nomi in bed to answer it.
- In the locker room of a pharmaceutical manufacturer, Kala finds it empty after hearing knocks. Her friends Padma, Ragini, and Devi join her, singing a joyful Indian love song about Kala's upcoming marriage, her promotion, and her moving to a big house. Ragini expresses concern about Kala forgetting them, but Kala reassures them she never will, ending the scene on a positive note.
- Kala, the protagonist, visits Ganesha's temple at night and offers him sweets, promising to donate bananas for the poor. She expresses her internal conflict about marrying Rajeev, whom she does not love, and asks Ganesha for a miracle to stop the wedding. The scene ends with Kala standing on a scale, having poured out her heart to the deity.
- Sun is working in her office when she is disturbed by the overpowering smell of incense. After determining that her assistant is not responsible, she learns from her brother's assistant that he has not yet arrived. The scene is serious and professional in tone, with Sun taking action by deciding to meet with Mr. Han-do in the conference room. The conflict of the incense's disruptive presence remains unresolved in this scene.
- Sun Bak, VP and CFO of Bak Industries, welcomes Yuen Tan-Wu, CEO of a Chinese development firm. Yuen dismissively questions Sun about her brother and makes inappropriate comments about her appearance and capabilities. Joong-Ki enters, easing the tension with humor and camaraderie. The scene ends with Joong-Ki asking Sun to get coffee, while Sun maintains her professionalism despite Yuen's chauvinistic attitude.
- In this tense and uncomfortable scene, Sun gets espressos for her brother and Joong-Ki, but Joong-Ki declines her offer to sit. As she walks to her father's office, she experiences a sudden change in environment, stepping into mud and hearing sounds from a Nairobi slum. She tries to ignore the stares and continues to her father's office, where the assistant stops her and informs her that he is out. The main conflict in this scene is Sun's desire to talk to her father, which is thwarted when she finds out that he is out of the office. The scene ends with Sun being informed that her father is out of the office and being stopped by the assistant.
- In this scene, Capheus, the main character, visits his godmother's apartment in Nairobi during the day. He has been having visions, including seeing his guardian spirit, which his godmother interprets as a sign that he is chosen for great things. Capheus expresses his doubts and fears, but his godmother reassures him and encourages him to embrace his destiny. The scene features a rooster that appears and disappears, and Capheus' godmother sitting cross-legged on a rug while Capheus stares at the rooster. The tone is comforting, reassuring, and mystical.
- Capheus recalls a poignant flashback of caring for his ailing mother with AIDS and seeing a blonde woman who later takes her own life. In the present, Capheus consults a 'godmother' figure to decipher the vision's meaning. The 'godmother' imparts that spirits often convey messages through symbols and metaphors, leaving the interpretation up to the individual. The scene is emotionally charged, with the 'godmother's' faint smile reminiscent of the blonde woman's. Capheus ultimately accepts the responsibility to interpret the vision's significance, with the 'godmother' urging him to search inward for answers.
- At Yuri Hassan's funeral, a priest delivers a solemn eulogy as elite Berlin crime families gather. Wolfgang, a thief suffering from a migraine, receives relief from Felix. Steiner, a rival, subtly hints at hidden secrets, causing undercurrents of tension. Paying respects to his uncle Sergai, Wolfgang is urged to visit his father's grave. Amidst the mourning crowd, Wolfgang finds a moment of solitude, setting the stage for personal contemplation.
- The scene is divided into two settings: a cemetery and Nomi's apartment. Wolfgang visits his father's grave, signifying a somber and reflective mood, while the atmosphere in Nomi's apartment is serious and sympathetic. Lola shares her traumatic past involving abuse, assault, and identity issues, which prevent her from obtaining proper documentation. Nomi, initially hesitant, agrees to help Lola with her illegal task if given more resources, showcasing Nomi's empathetic nature. The main conflict lies in Lola's inability to get proper documentation due to her past traumas. The scene ends with Nomi's agreement to help, leaving the resolution open for future events.
- Diego and Will, two cops, drive through a dangerous South Side neighborhood, discussing the hatred between gangbangers and cops. Diego shares a story about his dog sensing danger, and Will reflects on his past and his father's death. The scene is serious and contemplative, with moments of dark humor, and ends with the cops responding to a report of gunfire.
- In this tense scene, Will and Diego respond to gunshots at an abandoned building, where they meet a young kid with a gun. Simultaneously, in London, Riley is with Veejay, who offers her DMT and shares a personal story about his past struggles. The conflict arises when the young kid points the gun at Will, while Veejay's offer of DMT to Riley presents a potential conflict, which is not fully resolved in this scene. The tone is a mix of danger and vulnerability, with limited dialogue between Will and Diego, and a focus on Veejay's personal story in London.
- In an abandoned building, Will, a caring and determined individual, takes charge when Deshawn, a young boy, is shot. Despite Diego's refusal to call an ambulance, Will uses his own shirt to stop the bleeding and lifts Deshawn into his arms, instructing Diego to drive. The scene is tense and urgent, with a sense of danger and urgency.
- In this tense and reflective scene, Will drives a squad car through Chicago streets with Deshawn in the back seat, bleeding. While trying to help Deshawn, Will recalls a past incident when his father, sergeant Gorski, handcuffed him in a squad car for shoplifting. Young Will, however, managed to escape using a sewing needle. The scene highlights the immediate conflict of Deshawn's injury and the need for help, while also showcasing a past conflict between young Will and his father. The dialogue between Will and Deshawn reveals Will's past experiences in the back seat, while the flashback shows an argument between young Will and his father about the consequences of Will's actions. The scene ends with Will and Deshawn still in the moving squad car, with Deshawn's injury yet to be addressed.
- In a squad car, Deshawn and Will discuss their pasts, with Will revealing his father was a police officer and Deshawn sharing that his father was shot before he was born. Meanwhile, Wolfgang and Felix sit outside a mansion, discussing Wolfgang's father's obsession with cracking a safe. The scene is contemplative and tense, with moments of sadness and frustration, and ends with Wolfgang following a Mercedes that leaves the mansion gate.
- In this scene, Wolfgang and Felix break into a safe in a mansion while Nomi helps Lola erase her digital presence in San Francisco. The group is focused and determined as they work, but celebratory and joyful as they achieve their goals. Lola is thrilled with the result and hugs Nomi, expressing gratitude for her help. The scene ends on a positive note, with Disney mentioning that their mom will be happy to see Lola's new identity.
- In this somber and urgent scene, Deshawn, injured and shivering in the back of a police car driven by Diego, contemplates the possibility of an afterlife. Will tries to comfort him by sharing his disbelief in the afterlife and giving him his vest to keep warm. As they drive down a street in the daytime, Deshawn shares his beliefs about heaven and hell and his experiences with violence, ending with his belief that there cannot be a hell worse than Englewood, where he has experienced so much loss.
- Will, filled with determination, rushes Deshawn, a gunshot victim, into a hospital emergency room. The head nurse, adhering to hospital policy, refuses to treat Deshawn, leading to a tense confrontation. Amidst Will's desperate pleas, Deshawn's condition worsens as he goes into shock, and the scene concludes with the nurse's unwavering stance, leaving the conflict unresolved.
- Riley embarks on a DMT-induced psychedelic journey, hearing elves' voices and floating through worlds, while Will watches hospital staff attempt to save Deshawn's life. In a church, a nun declares her love before shooting Lito. Simultaneously, Wolfgang utilizes advanced technology to infiltrate a mansion in Korea. The scene concludes with Wolfgang successfully breaching the Korean mansion.
- In this introspective scene, Sun finds herself on a morning commuter train, with her mobile dead and replaced by the sound of crickets. Capheus is in a Shanty, taking care of his sick mother, while hearing the cheers from Delores Park. Nomi and Amanita are having a peaceful picnic in the park, experiencing silence. Kala is awakened by the sound of the ocean in her bedroom. Lastly, Riley is in Veejay's apartment, hearing the ocean as well, before she wakes up, unsure of her surroundings. Each character is experiencing their own world, with no interaction between them.
- The head nurse informs Will of Dr. Manno's successful surgery, introducing a moral conflict for Will regarding the doctor's past actions. Meanwhile, Wolfgang experiences an internal conflict as he struggles with a migraine while trying to crack a safe. Nomi provides a voiceover about Saint Thomas Aquinas' beliefs on sin, adding a contemplative tone to the scene. The scene takes place in a hospital waiting room, a mansion, and Nomi's apartment, and ends with Wolfgang still struggling to open the safe.
- Nomi, in a voice-over, reflects on Saint Thomas Aquinas' perspectives about sin and pride while the Dyke march is underway at Deloras Park during a Pride Festival. She articulates her personal reasons for participating, emphasizing the importance of community, love, and standing up against discrimination, hate, and shame. The scene concludes with Nomi's defiant statement, 'So go fuck yourself Aquinas,' symbolizing her rejection of stigmatizing beliefs.
- In this scene, Wolfgang, a safe-cracker, is disarming a safe with Felix timing him. After recognizing the sound of the dial from Will's description, Wolfgang takes a break and turns on the TV to Eurovision. They watch a young female singer, Natalie, and while Felix criticizes her appearance, Wolfgang appreciates her singing. The main conflict of the scene is Wolfgang's desire to take a break and Felix's insistence on focusing on the task, which is resolved when Wolfgang turns on the TV. The tone is tense during the safe-cracking, but becomes more relaxed and focused on appreciation of music during the Eurovision performance.
- The scene opens with a flashback to young Wolfgang's piano recital, where he is struck with stage fright and his father laughs at him from the back of the auditorium. In the present, Wolfgang watches as a woman receives a judgment offstage, with Felix commenting that he warned Wolfgang. The scene then shifts to a Pride festival in San Francisco, where Nomi and Amanita celebrate, reminiscing about their first Pride. The scene ends with Wolfgang standing on stage, Nomi eating a pot brownie, and the woman walking offstage after receiving her judgment.
- In this emotional and intimate scene, Amanita and Nomi share a kiss in Delores Park during their first Pride. However, tension arises when Nomi is criticized for her views on LGBT politics by one of Amanita's friends. Amanita defends Nomi, causing her to tear up and reveal that no one has ever defended her before. The scene ends with Amanita kissing Nomi, resolving the conflict and deepening their connection.
- In this scene, Nomi and Amanita attend the Dyke March in San Francisco, while Will and Diego investigate a location from Will's dream in Chicago. Nomi and Amanita interact affectionately, while Will and Diego banter about Will's actions. The conflict arises when Will becomes determined to investigate the location from his dream, despite Diego's skepticism. The scene ends with Will finding the location and Diego expressing his disbelief.
- Felix's alarm signals the end of something, while Wolfgang tries to decipher a combination in a separate location. Will and Diego examine a burned-out apartment where an angel committed suicide and discover a hidden compartment with evidence of drugs and a gun, but they're missing. The scene takes place in two different locations with the main conflict being the mystery of the missing evidence. The tone is contemplative and mysterious with key pieces of dialogue and significant visual elements highlighting the mystery.
- In Chicago, Will encounters Riley in a burned-out apartment, where Riley reveals she witnessed a woman's death. In San Francisco, Nomi's PTSD is triggered by Jonas's appearance at a parade, causing her to faint and fall off Amanita's bike. Meanwhile, in Berlin, Wolfgang and Felix steal diamonds from a mansion while eluding Steiner and his henchmen. The scene is filled with tension, mystery, and moments of surprise, leaving us eager to discover more about the characters' intertwined destinies.
- In a burned out apartment in Chicago, Will tries to understand Riley's confusion and fear as she claims to be from London and has never been to America. The scene cuts to London, where Veejay and Jacks are involved in a violent situation, and Riley sees something frightening. The scene ends with Riley disappearing, leaving Will concerned.
- Jacks, accompanied by Nocker, forces Veejay to open his safe at gunpoint, revealing a gun inside. Jacks mocks Riley and threatens both Veejay and Riley. Nocker fills Riley's purse with cash and DMT. A violent shootout ensues, resulting in the deaths of Jacks, Nocker, and Veejay, as well as severe injuries to the bodyguard. The scene is visually violent, with Riley standing alone in a room full of dead men and covered in blood by the end.
- Nomi, a transgender woman, wakes up in the hospital after an accident and corrects the nurse and her mother, Janet, that her name is Nomi. However, Janet struggles to accept Nomi's name and identity, causing tension. Nomi wants to see her partner, Amanita, but Janet refuses to let her in, stating only family is allowed in critical care. Teagan, Nomi's sister, tries to mediate the conflict. The scene ends with Janet promising to leave if Nomi still wants her to after speaking with Doctor Metzger.
- Turkel, the head of a taskforce to catch criminals, addresses a room full of cops, introducing himself and showing them pictures of the wanted criminal Jonas Barnett. Will, one of the cops, recognizes Jonas and reveals that he was with the woman who killed herself earlier, causing a conflict with Diego. The scene takes place in the police department's briefing room during the day and the tone is serious, with moments of humor. The scene ends with Will's revelation, potentially causing trouble for himself.
- In this light-hearted and celebratory scene, Felix puts on a fun and energetic karaoke performance of Beyonce's 'Crazy in Love' at Monster Ronson's Karaoke bar, receiving applause and laughter from the audience. He expresses his excitement and plans to sing 'Total Eclipse of the Heart' next. Wolfgang, who sits beside Felix, shares a moment of camaraderie and acknowledges their success together. The scene ends with Felix slapping Wolfgang on the back and expressing his excitement, while Wolfgang acknowledges their success together.
- Inside St. Mary's Hospital, Doctor Metzger diagnoses Nomi with Undifferentiated Frontal Lobe Syndrome (UFLS) and explains the risky, expensive surgery to treat it. Nomi's step-mother, Janet, brings up the need for insurance, causing tension in the scene. Nomi's sister, Teagan, tries to stop Janet from talking about money. The scene ends with Nomi processing the news of her diagnosis and the possibility of surgery.
- In the lively Monster Ronson's Karaoke bar at night, Wolfgang experiences rage after a drunk man heckles a young woman's performance, reminding him of his father. Simultaneously, Nomi, at St. Mary's Hospital, learns about the necessity and potential consequences of brain surgery from Dr. Metzger and her mother. The scene is filled with anger, tension, anxiety, and fear, capturing the contrasting emotions of the two characters as they face their respective conflicts.
- In a karaoke bar in Berlin, Wolfgang gets into a physical altercation with a drunk man, while in St. Mary's Hospital in San Francisco, Nomi, a trans woman, struggles with her identity and acceptance. Nomi becomes emotional when Janet, her adoptive mother, calls her by her birth name, Michael, leading to a heated exchange. Meanwhile, Wolfgang's anger and frustration are taken out on the drunk man. The scene highlights the conflicts in Nomi's life and Wolfgang's aggression, set in two different locations with contrasting tones.
- In a rainy alley at night, Riley, alone, weighs the option of discarding the money and drugs in her bag, signifying her internal conflict about her criminal lifestyle. However, she ultimately decides to run away with the bag, keeping her ties to this life. The scene is somber and reflective, with a hint of urgency as Riley makes her decision and takes action.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Will | Will starts as a rookie cop with an idealistic view of the world, eager to learn and help others. As he faces challenging situations and moral dilemmas, he grows into a determined and conflicted detective who carries emotional baggage from past events. Through his journey, Will learns to balance his sense of justice with his inner demons, ultimately becoming a compassionate and resilient police officer who is willing to go to great lengths to save lives. | The character arc for Will is well-developed, showcasing his growth and transformation throughout the feature. However, there could be more consistency in his rebellious nature and impulsiveness, as these traits are mentioned but not fully explored in the character descriptions. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on Will's internal struggles and how they impact his decisions and relationships. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that highlight Will's rebellious nature and impulsiveness, showing how these traits both help and hinder him in his journey. Explore his internal struggles in greater depth, delving into the root causes of his emotional baggage and how they shape his interactions with others. Additionally, provide more opportunities for Will to reflect on his growth and development throughout the feature, allowing the audience to see his transformation more clearly. |
Riley | Riley starts off as a mysterious and introspective character who is connected to a larger psychic network. Throughout the screenplay, she goes on a journey of self-discovery, facing her inner demons and vulnerabilities while also exploring the supernatural and unknown. As she witnesses violent events and experiences fear and horror, Riley's perspective on crime and violence begins to shift. By the end of the screenplay, Riley emerges as a more empowered and self-aware individual, finding peace and harmony within herself. | The character arc for Riley is well-developed and allows for growth and transformation throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more clarity in terms of how her experiences with witnessing violence and exploring the supernatural directly impact her personal growth. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on her connection to the larger psychic network and how it influences her actions and decisions. | To improve the character arc for Riley, consider delving deeper into her internal struggles and vulnerabilities, showing how they shape her interactions with others and her journey of self-discovery. Additionally, provide more context and development around her connection to the psychic network, highlighting its significance in her character development. Lastly, ensure that her experiences with violence and the supernatural have a clear and impactful effect on her growth and transformation throughout the screenplay. |
Nomi | Nomi starts as a free-spirited and passionate woman who embraces her sexuality with confidence. As the story progresses, she confronts difficult truths, challenges societal norms, and grapples with her identity and family acceptance. Facing a life-threatening medical condition, Nomi shows resilience and determination to overcome challenges, ultimately finding strength in her vulnerability and authenticity. | The character arc for Nomi is well-developed, showcasing her growth and inner struggles throughout the feature. However, there could be more consistency in her character traits and development to make her arc more impactful and cohesive. | To improve the character arc, consider establishing a clearer throughline for Nomi's journey, focusing on her core values and how they evolve over the course of the story. Additionally, ensure that her actions and decisions align with her established traits and motivations, creating a more cohesive and compelling character arc. |
Amanita | Throughout the screenplay, Amanita evolves from being a supportive and loving partner to Nomi to becoming a key player in their fight against external threats. As she defends Nomi with passion and loyalty, she also learns to navigate her own vulnerabilities and fears, ultimately growing into a stronger and more confident individual who stands up for what she believes in. | The character arc for Amanita is well-developed, showcasing her growth and transformation throughout the feature. However, there could be more exploration of her backstory and personal struggles to add depth to her character and enhance her emotional journey. | To improve the character arc for Amanita, consider incorporating flashbacks or dialogue that delves into her past experiences and traumas, shaping her motivations and fears. This will provide a richer understanding of her character and make her transformation more impactful for the audience. |
Kala | Kala starts off as a young woman trying to navigate societal expectations and her own desires. As the story progresses, she uncovers her hidden secret, which forces her to confront her inner turmoil and make difficult decisions. Through this journey, Kala learns to embrace her true self and find a balance between tradition and modernity, ultimately coming to terms with her identity and finding inner peace. | The character arc for Kala is well-developed and allows for significant growth and development. However, there could be more specific challenges or obstacles that Kala faces along the way to make her transformation more impactful and engaging for the audience. | To improve the character arc, consider introducing external conflicts or antagonists that directly challenge Kala's beliefs and values. This could create more tension and drama, leading to a more satisfying resolution for Kala's character arc. Additionally, explore Kala's relationships with other characters in more depth to further highlight her growth and development throughout the story. |
Sun | Sun starts as a determined and curious character focused on uncovering the truth, but as she faces professional challenges and personal confrontations, she learns to balance her duty towards her family with her own desires. Throughout the screenplay, she grapples with her inner conflicts and vulnerabilities, ultimately finding a way to reconcile them and embrace her true self. | The character arc for Sun is well-developed, but it could benefit from more specific and impactful moments that showcase her growth and transformation. Additionally, there could be more exploration of her relationships with other characters to further enhance her development. | To improve the character arc, consider adding key scenes that highlight Sun's internal struggles and growth, such as moments of self-reflection or interactions with other characters that challenge her beliefs. Additionally, delve deeper into her relationships with other characters to provide more depth and complexity to her journey. |
Capheus | Capheus starts off feeling inadequate and questioning his worth and purpose, but through his journey of caring for his sick mother and seeking spiritual guidance, he learns to embrace his destiny for greatness. He overcomes his self-doubt and finds strength in his compassion and resilience, ultimately realizing his true potential and the impact he can make in the world. | The character arc for Capheus is well-developed and allows for significant growth and transformation. However, it could benefit from more specific challenges and obstacles that Capheus must overcome to fully realize his potential. Additionally, there could be more depth added to his relationships with other characters to further enhance his development. | To improve the character arc, consider introducing more external conflicts and obstacles that force Capheus to confront his insecurities and push him out of his comfort zone. Develop his relationships with other characters to provide additional layers to his growth and showcase different aspects of his personality. Additionally, consider incorporating moments of self-discovery and realization that further solidify his journey towards embracing his destiny. |
Wolfgang | Wolfgang starts off as a skilled and confident thief, focused on his craft and driven by personal motivations. As the story progresses, he grapples with his past and family legacy, leading to moments of vulnerability and introspection. Through the challenges he faces, Wolfgang learns to confront his emotions and embrace his resilience, ultimately finding a sense of closure and redemption. | The character arc for Wolfgang is well-developed, showcasing his internal struggles and growth throughout the story. However, there could be more clarity in depicting the specific events or conflicts that trigger his emotional journey. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth could enhance the complexity of his arc. | To improve the character arc for Wolfgang, consider incorporating key moments or revelations from his past that directly impact his present actions and decisions. Develop his interactions with other characters to provide more insight into his emotional depth and inner conflicts. Allow Wolfgang to confront his vulnerabilities and fears more openly, leading to a more cathartic resolution by the end of the story. |
Felix | Throughout the screenplay, Felix starts off as a light-hearted and humorous character who provides comic relief. As the story progresses, he begins to show a more serious and supportive side, especially during high-stress situations. Felix's character arc culminates in a moment where he overcomes his fears and doubts to fully support Wolfgang in a crucial moment, showcasing his growth and loyalty as a friend. | The character arc for Felix is well-developed, showing a clear progression from a comedic relief character to a more serious and supportive friend. However, there could be more depth added to Felix's internal struggles and motivations, giving the audience a deeper understanding of his character development. | To improve the character arc for Felix, consider adding scenes that delve into his backstory or personal motivations, shedding light on why he behaves the way he does. This will add complexity to his character and make his growth throughout the screenplay more impactful for the audience. |
Diego | Diego starts off as a hardened and cynical cop, hesitant to help others due to the dangerous environment they work in. However, as the story progresses, he begins to soften his exterior and show more compassion towards the people they encounter. Through his interactions with Will and the challenges they face together, Diego learns to balance his skepticism with empathy, ultimately becoming a more well-rounded and understanding individual. | The character arc for Diego is well-developed and provides a clear progression for his growth throughout the feature. However, there could be more specific moments or scenes that highlight his transformation from a hardened cop to a more compassionate individual. Additionally, exploring his emotional baggage and struggles in more depth could add complexity to his character and make his arc even more compelling. | To improve the character arc for Diego, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into his past experiences and how they have shaped his cynical outlook. Show more instances where he is challenged to confront his emotional baggage and struggles, leading to moments of vulnerability and growth. Additionally, provide opportunities for Diego to have more meaningful interactions with other characters that further highlight his transformation and development. |
Janet | At the beginning of the screenplay, Janet is portrayed as a rigid and controlling mother who struggles to accept her daughter's identity. As the story progresses, she begins to realize the importance of supporting Nomi and allowing her to be true to herself. Through various challenges and conflicts, Janet learns to let go of her preconceived notions and ultimately embraces Nomi for who she truly is, leading to a more understanding and loving relationship between them. | The character arc for Janet is well-developed and provides a satisfying resolution to her internal conflict. However, to enhance the emotional impact of her transformation, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into the reasons behind Janet's initial reluctance to accept Nomi's identity. This could add complexity to her character and make her eventual acceptance more poignant. | Consider incorporating flashbacks or dialogue that reveal Janet's past experiences or beliefs that have shaped her views on identity and tradition. This will provide a deeper understanding of her character and make her journey towards acceptance more compelling for the audience. Additionally, exploring moments of vulnerability or self-reflection for Janet can further humanize her and make her transformation more impactful. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||
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Connections and Empathy | The screenplay features characters who can connect with each other across the world, and the story revolves around this concept. Empathy is also shown when characters try to understand and support each other. | This theme explores the importance of connections and empathy in building relationships and understanding between people, even when they are from different cultures or backgrounds. | ||
Strengthening Connections and Empathy:
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Identity and Self-Acceptance | Several characters struggle with their identity and self-acceptance, including Nomi, a trans woman who asserts her name and identity despite her mother's disapproval. | This theme highlights the importance of accepting oneself and being true to one's identity, despite societal or familial pressures. | ||
Violence and Loss | The screenplay features several instances of violence and loss, including shootings, deaths, and injuries. | This theme explores the consequences of violence and the emotional impact it has on individuals and communities. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to find peace, escape inner demons, and seek love and protection. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to protect herself, save others, investigate mysteries, and navigate dangerous situations. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict involves themes of redemption, forgiveness, duty, and connection, challenging the characters' beliefs and values. |
Character Development Contribution: The goals and conflict contribute to the protagonist's growth by challenging their beliefs, values, and actions, leading to introspection and evolution.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflict drive the narrative forward by creating tension, conflict, and resolution, shaping the character's journey and interactions with others.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflict add thematic depth to the screenplay by exploring complex themes of identity, redemption, connection, and inner struggles, highlighting the characters' humanity and growth.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Angel's Sacrifice: The Birth of a New Cluster | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful, Dark | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Desperate Pursuit and a Tragic End | Tense, Mysterious, Heartbreaking | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Will's Sensory Overload | Intense, Suspenseful, Dark | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Will's Frustration and Riley's Cab Ride | Mysterious, Intense, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Telenovela Film Set Disrupted by Nun's Plea | Intense, Tense, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Interrupted Intimacy and Creative Frustrations | Sensual, Playful, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 2 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Joyful Lockeroom Farewell Song | Humorous, Sentimental, Light-hearted | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
8 - A Plea for Love at Ganesha's Temple | Hopeful, Conflicted, Desperate | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Sun's Unsettling Workday | Tense, Mysterious, Serious | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Tense Meeting with Chinese Developer CEO | Tense, Confrontational, Sexist, Casual | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Sun's Unsuccessful Attempt to Speak with her Father | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Capheus' Destiny Revealed | Mysterious, Spiritual, Reflective | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Capheus Seeks Answers about a Haunting Vision | Mysterious, Reflective, Emotional | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - A Migraine Amidst Rivals: Wolfgang's Contemplation at Yuri Hassan's Funeral | Melancholic, Intense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Buried Past and Stolen Identity: A Tale of Two Cities | Intense, Emotional, Raw, Serious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Tension in a Dangerous Neighborhood | Tense, Dark, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Encounter with Danger and Vulnerability | Tense, Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Heroic Rescue in an Abandoned Building | Intense, Tense, Dramatic, Realistic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Rush Through the Past: A Squad Car Scene | Intense, Emotional, Flashback, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Past Hurts and Obsessions: A Tale of Two Conversations | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - A Successful Heist and a New Identity: Wolfgang, Nomi, and Lola Achieve Their Goals | Tense, Emotional, Suspenseful, Empowering | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Deshawn's Reflections on Life and Death | Tense, Grim, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Desperate Pleas in the Face of Hospital Policy | Intense, Heartbreaking, Frustrated | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Psychedelic Reality and Suspenseful Break-ins | Surreal, Intense, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Sens8: A Moment of Solitude | Mysterious, Introspective, Emotional, Surreal | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Moral Dilemmas and Internal Struggles | Tense, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Nomi's Empowering Voice: A Dyke March Awakening | Defiant, Reflective, Empowering | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 3 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Safe-Cracking and a Musical Interlude | Tense, Intense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Past Shame and Pride Celebration | Tense, Emotional, Reflective, Intense, Dark | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Amanita Defends Nomi at Pride | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Investigating the Dream and Enjoying the Dyke March | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Morning Alarm and Burned-Out Apartment Mystery | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Dark Secrets and Perilous Heists | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
34 - Riley's Confusion and a Violent Encounter | Suspense, Mystery, Fear | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | |
35 - Deadly Confrontation at Veejay's Apartment | Intense, Violent, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Nomi's Hospital Awakening and Identity Conflict | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Introduction of a New Taskforce and a Dangerous Criminal | Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Felix's Energetic Karaoke Performance at Monster Ronson's | Humorous, Heartfelt, Light-hearted | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 5 | 2 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Nomi's Life-Changing Diagnosis | Serious, Emotional, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - Two Paths, One Night - A Tale of Rage and Surgery | Intense, Emotional, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - Conflicts of Identity and Acceptance in Two Settings | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
42 - Riley's Solitary Struggle in the Rain | null | 0 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 0 | 0 | 8 | 7 | 0 | 7 | 0 | 0 | 7 | 0 | 0 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Emotional depth
- Compelling characters
- Engaging dialogue
- Intense atmosphere
- Mystery elements
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited plot progression
- Lack of external conflict
- Limited character development
- Some scenes may be too intense for sensitive viewers
- Possible need for more clarity in transitions between past and present
Suggestions
- Consider adding more external conflict to increase tension and plot progression
- Take a closer look at character development and consider ways to enhance it
- Re-evaluate scenes that may be too intense for some viewers and consider toning them down or providing warnings for sensitive audiences
- Be mindful of pacing issues and strive for clarity in transitions between different storylines or time periods
- Strive to make dialogue more impactful and nuanced, avoiding cliches and overly expository language
- Physical environment: The physical environment in the screenplay is diverse, ranging from burnt-out apartments, dark woods, urban alleys, and various indoor settings such as apartments, hospitals, mansions, and a karaoke bar. These settings contribute to the overall mood and tone of each scene, creating a sense of despair, mystery, tension, or celebration.
- Culture: The cultural elements present in the screenplay include diverse religious practices, supernatural themes, LGBTQ+ representation, and various ethnicities such as Indian, Maasai, and German. These cultural elements contribute to the unique atmosphere of each scene and add depth to the characters' experiences.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is depicted as hierarchical, with power dynamics and societal norms playing a significant role in shaping the characters' experiences. Conflict and tension between different societal groups, such as law enforcement and criminal elements, are also present.
- Technology: The technological elements in the screenplay are minimal, with the exception of advanced medical equipment, surveillance technology, and high-tech stethoscopes. These technological aspects contribute to the narrative by facilitating the characters' actions and adding tension to certain scenes.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by creating a sense of place and context. The characters' interactions with their surroundings reveal their personalities, motivations, and conflicts, driving the narrative forward.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by providing a rich and immersive setting for the characters' actions to unfold. The diverse locations, cultural practices, societal structures, and technological aspects add depth and complexity to the story, enhancing the overall narrative experience.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements also contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes such as identity, connection, power, and survival. The diverse cultural and societal structures reveal the characters' struggles and triumphs, while the physical environment and technology highlight the consequences of their actions.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of emotional depth, introspection, and vivid imagery. The dialogue is poetic, reflective, and filled with tension, while the narrative descriptions are atmospheric and evocative. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by enhancing the emotional impact of the scenes, creating a sense of mystery and intrigue, and delving into the characters' internal struggles and growth. |
Best Representation Scene | 13 - Capheus Seeks Answers about a Haunting Vision |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's poetic language, introspective tone, and focus on emotional depth and spiritual themes. The dialogue and narrative style effectively capture the writer's unique voice and storytelling approach. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Relationship between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade | There is a strong positive correlation between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade in this screenplay. Scenes with higher emotional impact tend to receive higher overall grades, indicating that emotional depth is a key factor in the quality of the scenes. |
Character Changes and Conflict | There is a positive correlation between Character Changes and Conflict in this screenplay. Scenes with more conflict tend to result in greater character changes, suggesting that conflict drives character development in the story. |
Dialogue and Emotional Impact | There is a positive correlation between Dialogue and Emotional Impact in this screenplay. Scenes with more impactful dialogue tend to have a higher emotional impact on the audience, indicating the importance of well-crafted dialogue in evoking emotions. |
Tone and Concept | There is a correlation between Tone and Concept in this screenplay. Scenes with a specific tone, such as 'Intense' or 'Tense', often align with the concept of the scene, suggesting that the tone sets the stage for the overall concept of the scene. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases the writer's talent for creating vivid and emotionally resonant storytelling, with strong character development and engaging conflicts. The scenes demonstrate a unique voice and a knack for exploring complex themes and emotions.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Save the Cat by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into structuring and pacing your screenplay, which can help refine the overall narrative arc and improve the transitions between scenes. |
Exercise | Practice writing dialogue scenes with subtext to deepen character relationships and conflicts.Practice In SceneProv | Improving your ability to convey emotions and motivations through dialogue will create more engaging and impactful moments in the narrative, allowing the audience to connect more intimately with the characters. |
Screenplay | Read 'Milk' by Dustin Lance Black | This screenplay explores similar themes of LGBTQ+ activism, identity, and pride, offering insights into character development, dialogue, and narrative structure. Studying this screenplay can help enhance the emotional impact and authenticity of character interactions in your screenplay. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Chosen One | Capheus, one of the main characters, is chosen for great things according to his godmother, who is a follower of the Maasai religion. | The Chosen One is a common trope in storytelling where a character is selected by a higher power or destiny for a significant purpose. This trope can be found in movies like 'The Matrix' and 'Star Wars'. |
Tragic Past | Several characters, including Will, Capheus, and Lola, have tragic pasts that influence their actions and decisions in the present. | The Tragic Past trope is used to give characters depth and motivation, often creating an emotional connection between the audience and the character. This trope can be found in movies like 'The Lion King' and 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind'. |
Unreliable Narrator | The story is told from multiple perspectives, some of which may be unreliable or biased. | The Unreliable Narrator trope is used to create suspense, mystery, or humor in a story. This trope can be found in movies like 'Fight Club' and 'A Beautiful Mind'. |
Forbidden Love | Kala, one of the main characters, is in a loveless arranged marriage and is struggling to fall in love with her soon-to-be husband. | The Forbidden Love trope is used to create tension and drama in a story. This trope can be found in movies like 'Romeo and Juliet' and 'The Notebook'. |
The Mentor | Jonas, another sense8, appears to help Angel as she goes through the painful process of connecting the cluster. | The Mentor trope is used to provide guidance, wisdom, and support to the main character. This trope can be found in movies like 'The Karate Kid' and 'Star Wars'. |
The Rival | Steiner, a rival, hints at having secrets of his own. Yuen makes inappropriate comments about Sun's appearance and qualifications. | The Rival trope is used to create conflict and tension in a story. This trope can be found in movies like 'Harry Potter' and 'Mean Girls'. |
The Hero's Journey | The story follows several characters as they go through a series of challenges and transformations, ultimately leading to their growth and self-discovery. | The Hero's Journey is a common narrative structure in storytelling, where the main character embarks on a quest, faces and overcomes challenges, and returns home transformed. This trope can be found in movies like 'The Lord of the Rings' and 'Indiana Jones'. |
The Mystical | The story features elements of mysticism, including a guardian spirit, a nun who shoots Lito, and a psychedelic trip experienced by Riley. | The Mystical trope is used to add a sense of wonder, mystery, and spirituality to a story. This trope can be found in movies like 'The Fifth Element' and 'Avatar'. |
The Anti-Hero | Wolfgang, one of the main characters, is a thief with a migraine who struggles with his father's obsession and his own rage. | The Anti-Hero trope is used to create a complex, morally ambiguous character who challenges the traditional hero archetype. This trope can be found in movies like 'Breaking Bad' and 'Fight Club'. |
The Love Triangle | Nomi and Amanita are in a relationship, but Nomi is recognized and criticized for her views on LGBT politics by a group of lesbian friends, causing tension and conflict. | The Love Triangle trope is used to create drama and tension in a story. This trope can be found in movies like 'Twilight' and 'The Hunger Games'. |
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When a group of strangers from around the world suddenly begin experiencing each other's lives, they must uncover the truth behind their newfound abilities and confront the forces that seek to destroy them. |
A diverse ensemble of characters discover they are 'sensates' - individuals with the ability to share each other's thoughts, experiences, and skills - and must work together to protect themselves from a shadowy organization intent on capturing and exploiting them. |
In a world where a select few possess the extraordinary ability to connect with and experience the lives of others, a group of strangers must navigate the complexities of their newfound bond and confront the unseen forces that threaten to tear them apart. |
A global thriller that explores the human experience through the lens of interconnected characters with extraordinary abilities, as they race to uncover the truth behind their shared experiences and confront the powers that seek to control them. |
'Sense8' is a multi-layered narrative that blends elements of drama, thriller, and sci-fi, following a diverse ensemble of characters who discover they share a profound psychic connection, and must work together to protect themselves and uncover the secrets of their extraordinary bond. |
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'Sense8' presents a compelling and ambitious narrative that explores the interconnected lives of a diverse ensemble of characters from around the world. The screenplay's strengths lie in its effective use of sensory experiences to link the characters, as well as its exploration of cultural and social themes. However, the pacing and character development could be tightened in places, and the overall narrative could benefit from increased clarity around the central mystery or driving force. With some refinement, this screenplay has the potential to be a captivating and thought-provoking feature film.