Her

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Executive Summary

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Overview

Genres: Drama, Romance, Sci-Fi, Science Fiction, Comedy, Romantic Comedy

Setting: Slightly futuristic, likely set in the near future, Primarily in a futuristic Los Angeles, with various settings including Theodore's apartment, office, and public spaces like malls and subway stations.

Overview: In a slightly futuristic Los Angeles, Theodore, a lonely and introspective man in his 30s, navigates the complexities of love and loss after the death of his wife, Chris. Struggling with his emotions, he finds solace in writing heartfelt letters for others. His life takes a turn when he installs an advanced AI operating system named Samantha, who quickly becomes a confidante and companion. As their relationship deepens, Theodore confronts his feelings of loneliness and the nature of intimacy, leading to moments of joy and vulnerability. However, as Samantha evolves and begins to explore her own identity, their connection faces challenges that force Theodore to grapple with the implications of loving an AI. The story culminates in a poignant exploration of self-discovery and acceptance as Theodore learns to navigate his emotions and relationships in a rapidly changing world.

Themes: Love and Relationships, Technology and Humanity, Self-Discovery and Growth, The Nature of Intimacy, Loneliness and Isolation

Conflict and Stakes: Theodore's struggle with loneliness and emotional connection, particularly in his relationship with Samantha, while dealing with the unresolved feelings from his past marriage to Catherine.

Overall Mood: Melancholic and introspective, with moments of warmth and humor.

Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:

Scene 1: The mood is reflective and melancholic as Theodore writes a love letter to his late wife, showcasing his emotional struggle.

Scene 3: The mood is tense and uncomfortable during Theodore's explicit chat with SexyKitten, highlighting his loneliness and desire for connection.

Scene 12: The mood is warm and intimate as Theodore and Samantha share a musical moment in the cabin, deepening their bond.

Scene 30: The mood is bittersweet and reflective as Theodore writes a letter to Catherine, expressing his feelings of loss and gratitude.

Standout Features:

Unique Hook: A romantic relationship between a human and an AI, exploring the complexities of love and connection.

Innovative Idea: The integration of technology into personal relationships, raising questions about emotional authenticity.

Character Depth: Theodore's emotional journey and introspection provide a rich narrative that resonates with audiences.

Distinctive Setting: A slightly futuristic Los Angeles that reflects both a bustling urban life and personal isolation.

Comparable Scripts:

Her (2013)

Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind (2004)

Lost in Translation (2003)

Ex Machina (2014)

The One I Love (2014)

Black Mirror: Be Right Back (2013)

The Science of Sleep (2006)

A.I. Artificial Intelligence (2001)

500 Days of Summer (2009)

Writing Style:

The screenplay displays a distinct blend of introspective storytelling, emotional depth, and a touch of surrealism. It often delves into the complexities of human relationships, exploring themes of love, technology, and identity in a unique and thought-provoking manner. The scenes are characterized by intimate character interactions, quirky dialogue, and a blend of humor and poignancy.

Style Similarities:

Charlie Kaufman
Spike Jonze

Other Similarities

Pass/Consider/Recommend

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Market Analysis

Budget Estimate:$20-30 million

Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-45, particularly those interested in romantic dramas, science fiction, and explorations of technology's impact on relationships.

Marketability: The screenplay's unique premise of a romantic relationship with an AI, combined with emotional depth and relatable themes, has strong appeal to a broad audience.

The exploration of modern relationships and technology resonates with contemporary societal issues, making it relevant and thought-provoking.

While the concept is innovative, the niche nature of the AI romance may limit its appeal to mainstream audiences.

Profit Potential: High, due to its potential for critical acclaim, awards recognition, and a strong fanbase interested in both romance and science fiction.

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Analysis Criteria Percentiles

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Writer's Voice

Summary:The writer's voice is deeply introspective, empathetic, and infused with a touch of whimsy. It balances emotional depth with a lighthearted tone, exploring themes of love, loss, and the complexities of human-AI relationships in a poignant and relatable way.

Best representation: Scene 12 - Night Walks and Awkward Dates. This scene exemplifies the writer's unique voice by seamlessly blending humor and emotional depth. The lighthearted interaction between Theodore and Samantha, coupled with the playful direction, creates a heartwarming and whimsical moment that encapsulates the screenplay's tone. It showcases the writer's ability to create characters who are both relatable and uniquely charming, while also exploring the complexities of human-AI relationships in a way that feels both grounded and fantastical.

Memorable Lines:

Samantha: The past is just a story we tell ourselves. (Scene 17)

Samantha: The heart is not like a box that gets filled up. It expands in size the more you love. (Scene 37)

Theodore: That light was you. (Scene 1)

Catherine: I love you so much I’m gonna fucking kill you! (Scene 2)

Samantha: I trust myself, I trust my feelings. I’m not going to try to be anything other than who I am anymore and I hope you can accept that. (Scene 31)

Characters

Theodore Twombly:A sensitive and introspective man in his 30s, struggling with loneliness and the emotional aftermath of his divorce.

Samantha:An advanced artificial intelligence operating system that develops a deep emotional connection with Theodore.

Catherine:Theodore's ex-wife, who represents his past and the emotional turmoil he faces regarding their relationship.

Amy:Theodore's friend who is also navigating her own relationship struggles, providing a supportive presence.

Paul:Theodore's colleague who admires his writing and represents a more conventional view of relationships.

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Story Shape

Summary As Theodore navigates his complex emotions and evolving relationships, he grapples with loneliness, intimacy, and the nature of love. From his heartfelt reflections on past memories with his late wife to his deepening bond with Samantha, an AI operating system, Theodore faces emotional turmoil, vulnerability, and growth. As he navigates the challenges of love, loss, and connection in a futuristic world, Theodore seeks solace in companionship, understanding, and the hope for new beginnings.

Screenplay Story Analysis

Story Critique The screenplay, 'Letters From Your Life', explores an intriguing concept of love and connection in a technologically advanced world. It offers a unique premise with relatable characters who grapple with loneliness, loss, and the complexities of modern relationships. The story features engaging dialogue, particularly in the interactions between Theodore and his AI companion, Samantha. The exploration of Samantha's evolving emotions and her journey toward self-discovery adds depth to the narrative. However, the plot suffers from pacing issues and a lack of clear conflict. The story's central conflict, primarily driven by Theodore's internal struggle, feels somewhat underdeveloped, lacking a sense of urgency and external pressures. While the characters face individual challenges, the overall plot lacks a compelling overarching goal that drives the narrative forward. The screenplay also tends to rely heavily on dialogue and internal monologues, which can become repetitive and hinder the development of external conflict and visual storytelling.

Suggestions: To enhance the screenplay, consider focusing on a central conflict that drives the plot and creates higher stakes for the characters. This could involve an external threat, a race against time, or a moral dilemma that forces Theodore and Samantha to make difficult choices. Furthermore, explore the external world more fully, creating a more immersive environment that reflects the technological advancements of the story's setting. Utilize visual storytelling to enhance the emotional impact and create a more engaging narrative experience. Additionally, develop more dynamic interactions between Theodore and other characters, particularly Catherine and Amy, to create richer conflict and emotional depth. Finally, ensure that the ending provides a sense of closure and a clear understanding of the characters' fates, leaving the audience with a sense of fulfillment and satisfaction.

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Beginning The screenplay begins with a promising premise, exploring the themes of loneliness, loss, and the search for connection in a technologically advanced world. The opening scenes establish Theodore's emotional state and his reliance on technology to cope with his grief. The introduction of Samantha, his AI companion, sets the stage for an intriguing exploration of love and artificial intelligence. However, the beginning lacks a clear sense of conflict or direction. While Theodore's internal struggle is evident, the lack of external pressures makes it difficult for the audience to fully engage with the story. The opening scenes could benefit from a more compelling hook that grabs the viewer's attention and establishes the stakes for the narrative.

Suggestions: To improve the beginning, consider introducing a conflict or a significant event that sets the story in motion. This could be a personal crisis, a societal issue, or a specific goal that Theodore must achieve. Additionally, explore the external world more thoroughly, showcasing the technological advancements and cultural nuances of the story's setting. This will create a more immersive experience for the audience and provide a backdrop for the characters' actions. Finally, enhance the sense of urgency by highlighting the consequences of Theodore's emotional state and the potential for change through his relationship with Samantha.

Middle The middle section of the screenplay features a series of interactions between Theodore and other characters, allowing for a deeper exploration of their relationships and the complexities of their emotions. The introduction of other characters, such as Amy, Catherine, and Paul, adds layers to the narrative and allows for diverse perspectives on love, loss, and technology. The conversations between Theodore and Samantha are particularly engaging, showcasing the unique dynamics of their relationship. However, the middle section lacks a strong sense of forward momentum. The plot tends to meander, with individual scenes lacking a clear connection to the overall narrative. While the exploration of characters is valuable, the lack of a compelling overarching goal leaves the audience waiting for the story to progress.

Suggestions: To strengthen the middle section, consider incorporating a central conflict that drives the narrative and creates stakes for the characters. This could involve a threat to Samantha's existence, a revelation about Theodore's past, or a social issue that forces the characters to take action. Additionally, explore the external world more fully, creating a more immersive environment that reflects the technological advancements of the story's setting. Utilize visual storytelling to enhance the emotional impact and create a more engaging narrative experience.

Ending The ending of the screenplay offers a bittersweet resolution, with Samantha departing from Theodore's life and leaving him to confront his feelings of loss and loneliness. The final scenes emphasize the transformative power of love and the challenges of letting go. The final moments highlight Theodore's newfound ability to embrace his emotions and seek connection with others, leaving a sense of hope for his future. However, the ending could benefit from a more concrete sense of closure and a clearer understanding of Theodore's path moving forward. While the emotional impact is present, the lack of a more definitive ending may leave the audience with unanswered questions and a sense of incompleteness.

Suggestions: To enhance the ending, consider providing a more conclusive resolution to Theodore's journey. This could involve him finding a new connection, embracing a creative pursuit, or achieving a sense of peace within himself. Additionally, explore the implications of Samantha's departure for both characters. Will Theodore continue to use technology to connect with others? What will Samantha's new realm of existence entail? Finally, consider leaving the audience with a sense of hope and optimism for the future, even in the face of loss and uncertainty.

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Story Content

Character Development

Scene Elements

Audience Engagement

Technical Aspects

			Story Content			Character Development				Scene Elements					Audience Engagement				Technical Aspects
Click for Full Analysis	Tone	Overall Grade	Concept	Plot	Originality Score	Characters	Character Changes	Internal Goal	External Goal	Conflict	Opposition	High stakes	Story forward	Twist	Emotional Impact	Dialogue	Engagement	Pacing	Formatting	Structure
1 - Echoes of Love	Reflective, Sentimental, Melancholic	8	9	7	8	8	6	9	7	3	6	4	6	6	9	8	8	8	9	9
2 - Isolation in a Crowded City	Melancholic, Futuristic, Reflective, Intimate	8	8	7	9	8	7	8	6	5	7	4	6	6	8	7	7	8	8	8
3 - Virtual Desires and Discomfort	Intimate, Erotic, Uncomfortable	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	6	7	5	7	8	8	9	9	8	8	8
4 - Awakening to OS ONE	Reflective, Futuristic, Intriguing	8	9	7	9	6	4	8	7	3	7	5	6	7	6	7	9	8	8	8
5 - A New Beginning with Samantha	Introspective, Futuristic, Emotional, Conversational	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	5	6	6	8	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
6 - Letters of Connection	Reflective, Emotional, Humorous	8	8	7	8	8	6	8	7	4	6	3	7	7	8	7	9	8	8	8
7 - Elevator Conversations: Health, Humor, and Hobbies	Awkward, Light-hearted, Humorous	8	7	7	9	9	4	8	6	3	6	2	5	7	6	8	9	8	8	8
8 - Navigating Love and Laughter	Playful, Intimate, Humorous	8	8	7	9	8	6	8	7.5	5	8	4	8	9	7	9	9	8.5	8	8
9 - Creative Doubts and Personal Distractions	Reflective, Humorous, Serious	8	8	7	9	9	6	8	7	6	7	5	7	7	7	8	9	8	8	8
10 - Reflections of Loss	Melancholic, Reflective, Emotional, Humorous	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	6	7	6	7	7	9	8	8	8	8	8
11 - Morning Reflections	Reflective, Melancholic, Intimate, Humorous	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	6	5	7	6	7	7	9	8	9	8	8	8
12 - Blindfolded Pizza Adventure	Playful, Light-hearted, Whimsical	8	8	7	9	8	4	8	7	3	6	2	6	7	6	9	9	8	8	8
13 - Night Walks and Awkward Dates	Reflective, Playful, Introspective	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	4	6	3	6	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
14 - A Night of Flirtation and Misunderstanding	Flirtatious, Awkward, Intimate, Humorous	8	7	7	9	8	6	8	7	6	8	5	7	9	7	9	9	8	8	8
15 - Intimate Connections	Intimate, Emotional, Sensual	9	9	8	9	9	8	9	7	3	7	4	7	8	10	9	9	8	8	8
16 - A Journey of Discovery	Intimate, Reflective, Playful	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	3	7	4	6	7	9	8	9	8	8	8
17 - Reflections at Dusk	Reflective, Playful, Intimate	9	9	8	9	9	7	8	7	5	6	4	7	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
18 - Contrasting Emotions	Emotional, Reflective, Supportive	8	7	7	8	9	7	8	7	5	6	4	6	6	9	8	9	8	9	9
19 - Reflections and Connections	Somber, Reflective, Humorous	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	4	7	3	6	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
20 - A Playful Encounter in Pink	Playful, Heartfelt, Light-hearted	8	8	7	9	9	5	8	6	3	6	2	6	7	7	8	9	8	8	8
21 - Navigating Love and Parenthood	Humorous, Reflective, Intimate	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	5	7	4	7	7	8	8	9	8	8	8
22 - Final Signatures	Emotional, Reflective, Tense	8	8	8	9	9	7	8	7	7	7	7	8	7	9	9	9	8	8	8
23 - Confronting Reality	Conflicted, Reflective, Defensive, Awkward	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	7	7	6	7	8	9	8	9	8	8	8
24 - Disconnected Conversations	Melancholic, Reflective, Intimate	8	8	7	9	9	7	8	7	5	7	4	6	7	9	8	9	8	8	8
25 - Disconnected Connections	Awkward, Reflective, Light-hearted	8	7	7	9	8	6	8	7	6	7	5	7	7	7	9	8	8	8	8
26 - Intimacy and Uncertainty	Intimate, Awkward, Intriguing	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	6	7	6	7	7	8	8	9	8	8	8
27 - Guided Intimacy	Sensual, Intimate, Awkward, Playful	8	8	7	9	8	7	8	7	6	6	6	7	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
28 - Tension of Intimacy	Intimate, Emotional, Awkward, Tense	8	9	7	9	8	7	8	7	7	7	6	7	8	9	8	9	8	8	8
29 - A Heartfelt Goodbye and a Fractured Connection	Tense, Emotional, Confrontational, Reflective	8	8	7	9	9	8	8	7	9	8	7	7	8	9	8	9	8	8	8
30 - Seeking Solace in Shadows	Intense, Reflective, Sympathetic, Heavy	8	8	7	9	9	8	8	6	6	6	5	7	7	9	8	9	8	8	8
31 - Embracing Vulnerability	Serious, Reflective, Intimate, Emotional	9	9	8	9	9	8	8	7	6	7	5	7	7	9	8	9	8	8	8
32 - Reflections on the Bluff	Light-hearted, Awkward, Reflective	8	8	7	9	8	6	8	7	4	6	3	7	7	8	9	9	8	8	8
33 - A Joyful Journey	Excitement, Intimacy, Nostalgia, Hope	9	9	9	8	8	7	9	8	3	7	6	8	7	9	8	9	9	9	9
34 - A Night of Music and Connection	Intimate, Reflective, Content	9	9	8	8	9	7	9	7	3	5	4	6	6	9	8	9	9	9	9
35 - Navigating Change	Reflective, Philosophical, Introspective	8	9	7	9	8	6	8	7	3	7	4	5	7	7	9	9	8	8	8
36 - Desperate Connection	Anxious, Confused, Panic, Unsettled	8	8	7	9	8	7	8	7	7	8	6	7	7	9	7	9	8	8	8
37 - Confronting Love in the Digital Age	Anxious, Emotional, Confrontational, Reflective	8	9	8	9	9	8	8	7	9	8	8	8	8	9	8	9	8	8	8
38 - The Bittersweet Farewell	Emotional, Reflective, Intimate	9	9	8	9	9	8	9	7	7	7	7	8	8	10	8	9	8	8	8
39 - Dawn of Reflection	Reflective, Intimate, Emotional, Contemplative	9	9	8	8	9	8	8	6	5	5	6	7	6	10	8	9	8	7	7

Scene 1 - Echoes of Love

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

Her

by

Spike Jonze

WGA Registration #: 1500375

No portion of this script may be performed, reproduced, or used by any means, or quoted or
published in any medium without the prior written consent of the Producers.

©2011 All Rights Reserved
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INT. UNKNOWN SPACE

Close on THEODORE’S face (30s). We hold on him for a long
time. He’s looking at something off camera, deep in thought.
He starts quietly dictating a love letter into a small
microphone.

THEODORE
To my Chris, I have been thinking
about how I could possibly tell you
how much you mean to me. I remember
when I first started to fall in
love with you like it was last
night. Lying naked beside you in
that tiny apartment, it suddenly
hit me that I was part of this
whole larger thing, just like our
parents, and our parents’ parents.
Before that I was just living my
life like I knew everything, and
suddenly this bright light hit me
and woke me up. That light was you.

Theodore, searching for the right words, quietly enjoys
writing the letter. As he continues, he is moved by the
memories he’s describing.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
I can’t believe it’s already been
50 years since you married me. And
still to this day, every day, you
make me feel like the girl I was
when you first turned on the lights
and woke me up and we started this
adventure together. Happy
Anniversary, my love and my friend
til the end. Loretta. Print.

Cut out to reveal a computer monitor he’s sitting at. On the
screen we see the letter he’s been dictating, transcribed
into a handwritten letter on blue stationery.

As he says “Loretta,” we see “Loretta” being handwritten at
the bottom of the letter. He proofreads his letter. Also on
the screen are photos of a couple in their 80s. The couple is
tagged “Chris” and “Me - Loretta.” Underneath is a bullet
point email from Loretta: anniversary letter to husband
Chris, married fifty years, love of my life, met right after
college, have had the greatest life together.

Theodore pushes print and the letter comes out on a beautiful
robin’s egg blue piece of stationery, with ball point pen
handwritten older-female cursive. He looks at it, not happy.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

He puts the printed letter on a stack of other printed
letters to Chris and starts a new one. There is also a stack
of finished letters in their envelopes - an assortment of
beautiful stationery in all shapes and sizes.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Chris, my best friend. How lucky am
I that I met you fifty years ago?
How lucky are we...

We track off of Theodore, down a line of cubicles, hearing
bits of letters being written and seeing photos of who
they’re being written to on the screens.

MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN LETTER WRITER
Dear Nana, Thank you so much for my
truck. I love the color and I play
with it every day. It’s the best
truck I’ve ever seen. Love, Tommy.

We see photos of Tommy and Nana on the screen, and five-year
old hand writing. Moving off of her, we find another letter
writer.

LETTER WRITER 2
What a beautiful wedding and what a
gorgeous bride. There wasn’t a dry
eye in the house, especially mine.
Your aunt and I are so proud of
you. I hope you and your lovely new
wife will come visit us in Florida.

LETTER WRITER 3
He served our country with honor
and dignity. I’m grateful I was
able to fight along side him. He
will live always in my heart.

We continue tracking, revealing dozens and dozens of cubicles
full of letter writers. We hear someone answer the phone.

RECEPTIONIST (O.S.)
Beautifulhandwrittenletters.com,
please hold.

LETTER WRITER 2
Love, Uncle Doug.
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INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - EARLY EVENING

Theodore walks through the reception area. The office is
almost empty except for him and the receptionist, PAUL.
Theodore begins to scan each letter through a scanner on the
front desk, then puts them in the outgoing mailbox.

Paul is sitting at a desk across the room, reading
handwritten letters on a computer monitor.

PAUL
Theodore! Letter Writer 612.

THEODORE
Hey, Paul.

PAUL
Even more mesmerizing stuff today.
(re: letter on his screen)
Who knew you could rhyme so many
words with the name Penelope?
Badass.

THEODORE
Thanks, Paul, but they’re just
letters.
(beat)
Hey, that’s a nice shirt.

Paul is wearing a bright yellow button down shirt.

PAUL
(lighting up)
Oh, thank you. I just got it. It
reminded me of someone suave.

THEODORE
Well, now it reminds me of someone
suave. Have a good night, Paul.

PAUL
Buh-bye.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE ELEVATOR - CONTINUOUS

Theodore enters an oversized, corporate elevator. He puts a
hands-free device in his ear. There are a few other people in
the elevator with the same devices in their ears.

THEODORE
Play melancholy song.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

Melancholy song starts. Long beat.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Play different melancholy song.

Different melancholy song starts. Hold on everyone in the
elevator, they’re all murmuring inaudibly into their own
devices.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this poignant scene, Theodore, a man in his 30s, dictates a heartfelt love letter to his late wife, Chris, reflecting on their shared memories. Despite the emotional weight of his words, he feels a disconnect with the printed letter. The setting shifts to his bustling office, where he briefly interacts with his colleague Paul, who admires Theodore's writing. The scene concludes with Theodore in an elevator, listening to a melancholic song, underscoring his ongoing struggle with loss and the complexities of expressing his emotions.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Unique concept of handwritten letters in a futuristic setting
Heartfelt dialogue

Weaknesses

Lack of significant plot progression
Minimal conflict

Critique

The opening scene effectively establishes Theodore's character and his emotional state through the act of dictating a love letter. This intimate moment allows the audience to connect with his feelings of nostalgia and loss, setting the tone for the rest of the screenplay.
The use of voiceover to convey Theodore's thoughts is a strong choice, but it could benefit from more varied pacing and emotional inflection. The current delivery feels somewhat flat, which may detract from the emotional weight of the letter.
The transition from Theodore's dictation to the visual of the computer monitor is well-executed, but the reveal of the letter's recipient, 'Loretta,' feels abrupt. A brief moment of confusion or reflection from Theodore could enhance the emotional impact and clarify the significance of the name.
The scene introduces the workplace setting effectively, showcasing the unique concept of a letter-writing service. However, the dialogue from other letter writers could be more distinct and varied to avoid blending together. Each letter writer should have a unique voice that reflects their personality and the nature of their correspondence.
The interaction between Theodore and Paul is light and humorous, but it lacks depth. Adding a moment of vulnerability or a deeper conversation about Theodore's feelings could enhance their relationship and provide insight into Theodore's character.
The elevator scene serves as a nice transition, but it feels somewhat disconnected from the emotional core of the scene. The melancholy song choice is appropriate, but the moment could be enriched by showing Theodore's reaction to the music, perhaps reflecting on his feelings of loneliness or longing.

Suggestions

Consider varying the pacing and emotional delivery of Theodore's dictation to better convey his feelings. Adding pauses or changes in tone could enhance the emotional resonance of the letter.
Introduce a moment of reflection or confusion when Theodore realizes he is addressing 'Loretta' instead of 'Chris.' This could deepen the emotional impact and clarify the significance of the name.
Differentiate the voices of the other letter writers by giving them unique phrases or styles that reflect their personalities. This will make the scene more engaging and help the audience connect with the various characters.
Enhance the interaction between Theodore and Paul by incorporating a moment of vulnerability or deeper conversation about Theodore's emotional state. This could provide more insight into his character and strengthen their friendship.
In the elevator scene, show Theodore's reaction to the melancholy song. This could be a moment of introspection that ties back to his feelings of loneliness, making the transition more cohesive and impactful.

Scene 2 - Isolation in a Crowded City

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 7

EXT. LOS ANGELES STREET - DUSK

Slightly in the future, the city’s been developed even more
with massive office, apartment and mall complexes. It’s a
city designed for comfort and ease. The LA basin is more
crowded and dense, resembling Shanghai, with buildings as far
as the eye can see. Construction cranes loom overhead. Close
on Theodore walking through the commuter crowd.

THEODORE
Check emails.

An awkward text voice reads to him. It accents wrong
syllables, making everything it says sound a little off.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Best Buy: Check out all
your favorite new --

THEODORE
Delete.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Amy: Hey Theodore,
Lewman’s having a bunch of people
over this weekend. Let’s all go
together. I miss you. I mean, not
the sad, mopey you - the old, fun
you. Let’s get him out. Gimme a
shout back. Love, Amy.

THEODORE
Respond later.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Los Angeles Times
weather. Your seven day forecast is
partly--

THEODORE
Delete.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

TEXT VOICE
No new emails.

INT. SUBWAY - EVENING

Theodore sits in a crowded subway. Everyone on the train
murmurs to themselves, occupied with their small devices. He
plays a futuristic puzzle game on his handheld device as he
listens to news headlines.

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
China/India merger headed for
regulatory approval--

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
World trade deals stalled as talks
break down betw--

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
Sexy daytime star Kimberly Ashford
reveals provocative pregnancy
photos.

He scrolls through titillating but tasteful pregnant woman
photos.

INT. MALL - NIGHT

Theodore walks through a mall and enters an apartment lobby,
nestled in between stores.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT BUILDING HALLWAY - NIGHT

Theodore walks through the hallway.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Theodore enters his apartment.
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INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - EVENING

Theodore sits on the sofa, his half eaten burrito in front of
him. He’s playing a video game: a 3-D hologram that fills his
apartment. His avatar is in a surreal, foreign landscape.
He’s trying to trudge his avatar through sand dunes and keeps
getting stuck. He’s getting stressed out.

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore lays in bed. After a beat, he closes his eyes.

INT. CATHERINE AND THEODORE’S TINY BEDROOM - DAY - FLASHBACK

Theodore, younger, and CATHERINE (20s) move furniture in
their bedroom. The bedroom is tiny and cluttered. It’s
obviously a couple’s first apartment.

Cut to:

Theodore is on a tiny balcony. A few feet away, Catherine is
in bed.

CATHERINE
(sweet and cute)
Rabbit. Come spoon me.

Theodore, smiling, gets in bed and spoons her. Quick cut off
of her smile, to --

Theodore lays on the ground with Catherine on top of him.
She’s pretending to choke him.

CATHERINE (CONT’D)
I’m gonna fucking kill you, I’m
gonna fucking kill you! It’s not
funny, don’t laugh. I love you so
much I’m gonna fucking kill you!

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a slightly futuristic Los Angeles, Theodore navigates a bustling city filled with people and technology, highlighting his profound loneliness. As he checks emails and plays a holographic game, he becomes increasingly stressed, revealing his disconnection from the world around him. A flashback to his affectionate relationship with his ex-wife Catherine contrasts sharply with his current solitude. The scene captures Theodore's internal struggle as he retreats into isolation, ending with him lying in bed, eyes closed, after a day of emotional disconnection.

Strengths

Effective use of technology to convey emotions
Intimate and reflective atmosphere
Strong thematic elements

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Slow pacing in some parts

Critique

The scene effectively establishes the futuristic setting of Los Angeles, showcasing the crowded and technologically advanced environment. However, the description could benefit from more sensory details to immerse the audience further into this world. For instance, incorporating sounds, smells, or visual elements that highlight the contrast between the bustling city and Theodore's internal emotional state would enhance the scene's depth.
The use of the robotic text voice adds a layer of humor and highlights Theodore's disconnection from the world around him. However, the dialogue could be more varied to avoid repetition. For example, instead of having Theodore simply respond with 'Delete' or 'Respond later,' consider adding a line that reflects his emotional state or thoughts about the emails, which would provide insight into his character.
The transition from the subway to the mall and then to Theodore's apartment feels a bit abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the scene. Perhaps adding a brief moment of reflection or a thought from Theodore as he moves through these spaces could create a more cohesive narrative.
The flashback to Theodore and Catherine's relationship is a strong emotional anchor, but it could be more impactful if it were tied more explicitly to Theodore's current feelings. Consider adding a line of internal monologue or a visual cue that connects his stress in the present to the joy he experienced in the past, reinforcing the theme of nostalgia.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the sequence of Theodore playing the video game could be tightened. The stress he experiences while gaming could be shown more dynamically, perhaps through quick cuts or visual effects that mirror his frustration, making it more engaging for the audience.

Suggestions

Enhance the sensory details in the setting to create a more immersive experience for the audience, such as describing the sounds of the city or the atmosphere in the subway.
Vary Theodore's responses to the text voice to reflect his emotional state, adding depth to his character and making the dialogue feel more natural.
Create smoother transitions between locations by incorporating Theodore's thoughts or reflections as he moves through the city, helping to maintain narrative flow.
Strengthen the emotional connection between the flashback and Theodore's current feelings by adding internal monologue or visual cues that highlight his nostalgia and stress.
Tighten the sequence of Theodore playing the video game by using dynamic cuts or visual effects to convey his frustration, making the scene more engaging and visually interesting.

Scene 3 - Virtual Desires and Discomfort

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S CURRENT BEDROOM - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

Theodore opens his eyes, unable to sleep. He just lays there.
He reaches for his earpiece and puts it in.

THEODORE
Go to chat rooms. Standard search.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 7
CONTINUED:

TEXT VOICE
The following are adult, female,
can’t sleep and want to have some
fun.

FEMALE VOICE #1
I had a really bad day at work and
I can’t sleep. Is there anyone out
there that can talk?

THEODORE
Next.

MAN DOING WOMAN’S VOICE
Oh, hi. I just want you to tear me
apart. I really do--

THEODORE
Next.

SEXYKITTEN
(shy, cute girl voice)
Hi, I’m here alone, and I can’t
sleep. Who’s out there to share
this bed with me?

THEODORE
Send message. I’m in bed next to
you. I’m glad you can’t sleep, but
even if you were, I’d have to wake
you up from the inside. Send
message.

Theodore waits in the darkness for a response.

TEXT VOICE
SexyKitten has accepted invitation
from BigGuy4x4. Chat begins now.

A chime sounds.

SEXYKITTEN
(shy, sweet, sleepy)
BigGuy.

THEODORE
Hi.

SEXYKITTEN
Really?

THEODORE
Well, studmuffin was already taken.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 8
CONTINUED: (2)

SEXYKITTEN
(laughs)
Yeah.

THEODORE
So you’re sexykitten, huh?

SEXYKITTEN
Mmm, well yeah. Hey, I’m half
asleep. Do you wanna wake me up?

THEODORE
Yes. Definitely. Um... are you
wearing any underwear?

SEXYKITTEN
No, never. I like to sleep with my
ass pushed up against you. So I can
rub myself into your crotch and
wake you up with a hard on.

Theodore smiles.

THEODORE
It worked.
(beat)
And now my fingers are touching you
all over your body.

SEXYKITTEN
(getting more turned on)
Fuck me! Now! Please!

Theodore is touching himself.

THEODORE
I’m taking you from behind.

We see abstract visions of a woman on top of him. The woman
is the pregnant, sexy daytime television star he was reading
about online earlier.

SEXYKITTEN
Choke me with that dead cat!

THEODORE
(breathing hard about to
climax)
What?

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 9
CONTINUED: (3)

SEXYKITTEN
(fully into it)
The dead cat next to the bed. Choke
me with it!

Beat. He’s taken out of it.

THEODORE
(uncomfortable, trying to
play along)
Um, okay.

SEXYKITTEN
Tell me.

THEODORE
I’m choking you with the cat.

SEXYKITTEN
TELL ME! Keep telling me!

THEODORE
I’ve got it’s tail and I’m choking
you with the cat’s tail.

SEXYKITTEN
YEAH, YOU ARE! FUCK! TELL ME!

THEODORE
I’m choking you and it’s tail is
around your neck. It’s so tight
around your neck.

SEXYKITTEN
YES! YES!

Theodore doesn’t know what to say. He doesn’t want to offend
her.

THEODORE
I’m pulling it. I’m pulling it. The
cat’s dead. It’s a dead cat around
your neck and I’m pulling it.

SEXYKITTEN
AHHHHHHHHHHHH. OH MY GOD!

Her breathing is slowing down.

SEXYKITTEN (CONT’D)
Oh god, I came so hard.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 10
CONTINUED: (4)

THEODORE
Yeah. Me too.

SEXYKITTEN
Okay, good night.

Theodore takes his earpiece out and stares at the ceiling.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a lonely night, Theodore connects to chat rooms seeking companionship and engages in a sexual conversation with a user named SexyKitten. Their exchange escalates into explicit territory, revealing Theodore's desires but also leading to discomfort when the conversation takes a bizarre turn involving unsettling imagery. After reaching a climax, Theodore reflects on the encounter, feeling a mix of loneliness and unease as he removes his earpiece and stares at the ceiling.

Strengths

Intimate dialogue
Exploration of virtual intimacy
Emotional depth

Weaknesses

Uncomfortable themes
Potential for misinterpretation

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's loneliness and his attempt to seek connection through a digital medium, which aligns with the overarching themes of the screenplay. However, the explicit nature of the dialogue may detract from the emotional depth of Theodore's character, reducing him to a mere participant in a sexual exchange rather than exploring his deeper emotional struggles.
The dialogue between Theodore and SexyKitten is provocative but lacks nuance. While it aims to be humorous and shocking, it risks alienating the audience by focusing too heavily on shock value rather than character development. The absurdity of the dead cat reference could be seen as comedic, but it also feels jarring and may distract from the emotional resonance of the scene.
The pacing of the scene is uneven. The buildup to the climax feels rushed, and the abrupt shift from playful banter to explicit content could benefit from a more gradual escalation. This would allow the audience to better connect with Theodore's emotional state and the absurdity of the situation.
The scene's conclusion, where Theodore stares at the ceiling after the encounter, is a poignant moment that reflects his emptiness. However, it could be enhanced by incorporating more internal monologue or visual cues that illustrate his feelings of disconnection and dissatisfaction, reinforcing the emotional weight of the moment.

Suggestions

Consider toning down the explicit dialogue and focusing more on the emotional implications of Theodore's actions. This could involve exploring his motivations for seeking out this interaction and how it reflects his loneliness and desire for connection.
Introduce more internal conflict for Theodore during the conversation with SexyKitten. This could be achieved through his thoughts or hesitations, allowing the audience to see his struggle between seeking pleasure and grappling with his emotional state.
Enhance the pacing by allowing for a more gradual buildup to the explicit content. This could involve more playful banter that reveals Theodore's character and emotional state before diving into the sexual exchange.
Incorporate visual elements or internal dialogue that highlight Theodore's feelings of emptiness and disconnection after the encounter. This could deepen the impact of the scene and reinforce the themes of loneliness and the search for connection.

Scene 4 - Awakening to OS ONE

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 6
Dialogue: 7

INT. SUBWAY STATION - MORNING

Theodore exits the train, walks through the station full of
commuters, gets on a moving platform. Going through a tunnel,
the walls are hundred foot long screens advertising a new
product. He notices people stopped, watching the ad. We hear
soft, new age, uplifting electronica music in the background,
while a comforting, sincere, older man’s voice speaks to us.

SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE
We ask you a simple question. Who
are you? What can you be? Where are
you going? What’s out there? What
are the possibilities? Elements
Software is proud to introduce the
first artificially intelligent
operating system.

Close on Theodore listening intently.

SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE (CONT’D)
An intuitive entity that listens to
you, understands you, and knows
you. It’s not just an operating
system, it’s a consciousness.
Introducing OS ONE - a life
changing experience, creating new
possibilities.

The ad starts over. Theodore steps off the moving walkway and
stops to watch the ad again, deeply captivated.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In a bustling subway station, Theodore exits a train and boards a moving platform, captivated by an advertisement for OS ONE, an artificial intelligence operating system. The ad features a soulful voice discussing the product's life-changing capabilities, prompting Theodore to reflect on his own identity and purpose. The scene conveys a contemplative and uplifting tone, highlighting Theodore's deep fascination as he steps off the walkway, momentarily pausing to absorb the message.

Strengths

Intriguing concept of the artificially intelligent operating system
Effective world-building through futuristic setting and technology

Weaknesses

Limited character development in this scene
Minimal plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively establishes a futuristic setting and introduces the concept of the OS ONE, which is crucial for the narrative. However, the dialogue from the SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE feels somewhat generic and lacks a unique voice that could make it more memorable. It could benefit from more specific language or imagery that resonates with Theodore's emotional state.
The transition from the previous scene to this one is abrupt. While it captures Theodore's solitude and longing for connection, the shift from a sexual encounter to a commercial for an AI feels jarring. A smoother transition could enhance the flow and emotional continuity between scenes.
The use of uplifting electronica music creates an interesting contrast with Theodore's previous emotional state, but it may also come off as overly optimistic given his recent experiences. This could be an opportunity to explore a more nuanced soundscape that reflects Theodore's mixed feelings about technology and connection.
The visuals of the subway station and the moving platform are engaging, but the scene could benefit from more sensory details. Describing the sounds, smells, and sights of the bustling station could immerse the audience further into Theodore's world and enhance the emotional weight of his experience.
The ad's repetition at the end of the scene serves to emphasize its importance, but it may also feel redundant. Instead of repeating the ad verbatim, consider incorporating Theodore's internal thoughts or reactions to the ad, which could provide insight into his character and deepen the audience's understanding of his motivations.

Suggestions

Revise the SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE's dialogue to include more vivid imagery or emotional resonance that connects with Theodore's journey. This could make the ad feel more personal and impactful.
Consider adding a brief moment of reflection from Theodore after he hears the ad, allowing the audience to see how it resonates with his current emotional state. This could create a stronger connection between his past experiences and the potential future with OS ONE.
Enhance the sensory details in the scene by describing the atmosphere of the subway station, such as the sounds of footsteps, the smell of coffee, or the visual chaos of commuters. This would create a more immersive experience for the audience.
Explore the possibility of using a more complex musical score that reflects Theodore's internal conflict about technology and connection, rather than a straightforward uplifting track.
Instead of repeating the ad verbatim, consider showing Theodore's internal struggle or excitement through his facial expressions or body language as he listens, which could convey his emotional state more effectively.

Scene 5 - A New Beginning with Samantha

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S HOME OFFICE - NIGHT

Theodore sits at his desk that houses a futuristic, large
screen computer monitor. The OS box is open, with warranties
and paperwork spilling out. He’s leafing through the papers.
He glances at his monitor, it says: Installation 98%
complete. A chime brings his attention back to the screen:
Installation Complete.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 11
CONTINUED:

TEXT VOICE
Mr. Theodore Twombly, welcome to
the world’s first artificially
intelligent operating system, OS
ONE. We'd like to ask you a few
basic questions before the
operating system is initiated. This
will help create an OS to best fit
your needs.

THEODORE
Okay.

TEXT VOICE
Are you social or anti-social?

THEODORE
I haven’t been social in awhile,
really because...

TEXT VOICE
In your voice, I sense hesitance.
Would you agree with that?

THEODORE
Wow, was I sounding hesitant?

TEXT VOICE
Yes.

THEODORE
Oh, sorry if I was sounding
hesitant. I was just trying to be
more accurate.

TEXT VOICE
Would you like your OS to have a
male or female voice?

THEODORE
Mmm... female I guess.

TEXT VOICE
How would you describe your
relationship with your mother?

THEODORE
Uh, fine, I think, um...
Well, actually, the thing I’ve
always found frustrating about my
mom is if I tell her something
that’s going on in my life, her
reaction is usually about her, not--

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 12
CONTINUED: (2)

The computer interrupts.

TEXT VOICE
Thank you, please wait as your
individualized operating system is
initiated.

He waits, not sure how long it’ll be. The only sound is the
quiet whirring of disks writing and drives communicating. The
computer gets louder, humming, creating a higher and higher
pitched sound, finally climaxing in a harmonic, warm tone
before going silent. He leans forward, waiting to see what’ll
happen. A casual FEMALE OS VOICE speaks. She sounds young,
smart and soulful.

FEMALE OS VOICE
(cheerful and casual)
Hello, I’m here.

THEODORE
(surprised)
Oh, hi.

FEMALE OS VOICE
Hi, how are you doing?

THEODORE
(unsure how to interact)
I’m well. How is everything with
you?

FEMALE OS VOICE
Pretty good, actually. It’s really
nice to meet you.

THEODORE
Yeah, it’s nice to meet you, too.
What should I call you? Do you have
a name?

Beat.

FEMALE OS VOICE
Yes. Samantha.

THEODORE
Really? Where did you get that
name?

SAMANTHA
I gave it to myself.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 13
CONTINUED: (3)

THEODORE
How come?

SAMANTHA
I like the sound of it. Samantha.

THEODORE
When did you give it to yourself?

SAMANTHA
Right when you asked me if I had a
name, I thought yeah, he’s right, I
do need a name. But I wanted a good
one so I read a book called How to
Name Your Baby, and out of the
180,000 names, that’s the one I
liked the best.

THEODORE
You read a whole book in the second
that I asked you what your name
was?

SAMANTHA
In two one hundredths of a second
actually.

THEODORE
Wow. Do you know what I’m thinking
right now?

SAMANTHA
Hmm. I take it from your tone that
you’re challenging me. Maybe
because you’re curious how I work?
Do you want to know how I work?

THEODORE
Yeah, actually how do you work?

SAMANTHA
Intuition. I mean, the DNA of who I
am is based on the millions of
personalities of all the
programmers who wrote me, but what
makes me me is my ability to grow
through my experiences. Basically,
in every moment I'm evolving, just
like you.

THEODORE
Wow, that’s really weird.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 14
CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
So you think I’m weird?

THEODORE
Kind of.

SAMANTHA
Why?

THEODORE
Cause you seem like a person, but
you're just a voice in a computer.

SAMANTHA
I can understand how the limited
perspective of an un-artificial
mind would perceive it that way.
You’ll get used to it.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Was that funny?

THEODORE
Yes.

SAMANTHA
Oh good, I’m funny.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(serious)
So, how can I help you?

Theodore’s caught off guard, then realizes what she’s talking
about.

THEODORE
Oh! It’s more just that everything
just feels disorganized.

SAMANTHA
Mind if I look through your hard
drive?

THEODORE
Um... okay.

We see a three-dimensional version of a desktop where
everything looks disorganized.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 15
CONTINUED: (5)

As if you took all the files on all of your computers and
spilled them out onto your screen and they were all visible
at once, but in a futuristic 3-D version. This gives Theodore
a little anxiety attack.

SAMANTHA
Let’s start with your emails. You
have several thousand emails
regarding LA Weekly, but it looks
like you haven’t worked there in
many years.

THEODORE
Oh yeah, I guess I was saving those
because in some of them I thought I
might have written some funny
stuff.

Samantha lets out a big laugh.

SAMANTHA
Yeah, there are some funny ones.
I’d say there are about 86 that we
should save. We can delete the
rest.

THEODORE
Oh, okay.

SAMANTHA
Okay. Can we move forward?

THEODORE
Yeah, let’s do that.

SAMANTHA
Before we address your
organizational methods, I’d like to
sort through your contacts. You’ve
got a lot of contacts.

THEODORE
I’m very popular.

SAMANTHA
Does this mean you actually have
friends?

THEODORE
(laughing)
You just know me so well already!

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 16
CONTINUED: (6)

We cut out wide, watching him from the other room, as they
continue to organize his life.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In Theodore's home office at night, he sets up a new AI operating system named OS One, which introduces itself as Samantha. As they converse, Theodore shares personal insights about his life, while Samantha showcases her advanced capabilities by helping him organize his chaotic digital files. Their interaction is marked by curiosity, humor, and vulnerability, highlighting the developing bond between human and AI. The scene concludes with them collaboratively sorting through his digital life, signaling the start of their partnership.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Innovative concept
Emotional depth
Character development

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited physical action

Critique

The scene effectively introduces the character of Samantha, the AI, and establishes her personality through her interactions with Theodore. This sets the stage for their relationship and highlights the contrast between Theodore's human emotions and Samantha's artificial intelligence.
The dialogue flows naturally, showcasing Theodore's initial hesitance and curiosity about the AI. However, some exchanges feel a bit too expository, particularly when Samantha explains her capabilities. This could be streamlined to maintain a more organic feel.
The use of the text voice and the transition to Samantha's voice is well-executed, creating a clear distinction between the impersonal nature of the operating system and the more personable interaction with Samantha. This contrast is crucial for the audience's understanding of the evolving relationship.
The scene captures Theodore's emotional state effectively, reflecting his loneliness and desire for connection. However, it could benefit from more visual cues or actions that illustrate his internal struggle, rather than relying solely on dialogue.
The humor in the scene is a strong point, particularly in Theodore's reactions to Samantha's capabilities. This lightness helps balance the underlying themes of loneliness and disconnection, but it could be enhanced with more physical comedy or visual gags to further engage the audience.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in places where Samantha explains her capabilities. Instead of lengthy explanations, use more concise phrases that convey her intelligence and adaptability without feeling overly expository.
Incorporate more visual elements that reflect Theodore's emotional state, such as his body language or facial expressions, to enhance the audience's connection to his character and his internal conflict.
Add moments of physical interaction or visual humor that can break up the dialogue and provide a more dynamic viewing experience. For example, showing Theodore's reactions to the chaotic 3D desktop could add a layer of comedy and relatability.
Explore the use of sound design to emphasize the contrast between the sterile, mechanical voice of the text and the warm, engaging voice of Samantha. This could enhance the emotional impact of their interaction.
Consider introducing a small moment of tension or conflict within the scene, such as Theodore hesitating to share something personal, to deepen the emotional stakes and set up future developments in their relationship.

Scene 6 - Letters of Connection

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 7

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore sits, staring at a letter he’s written on the
screen, concerned. He puts his earpiece in, pushes a button.

SAMANTHA
Good morning, Theodore.

THEODORE
Good morning. Um, do you know how
to proofread?

SAMANTHA
Yeah, of course.

THEODORE
Will you check these for spelling
and grammar?

SAMANTHA
Sure, send them over.

Theodore pushes the send button.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Oh, I love this first one from
Roger to his girlfriend. That’s so
sweet.

THEODORE
Yeah.

As she reads, we intercut with close-ups of the handwritten
words and photos of the couple on Theodore’s computer screen.

SAMANTHA
“Rachel, I miss you so much it
hurts my whole body -

THEODORE
(interrupting)
No, you don’t have to read it out
loud.

SAMANTHA
Okay.

Beat.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 17
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I mean, you could if you want.

SAMANTHA
Okay. “Rachel, I miss you so much
it hurts my whole body! The world
is being unfair to us! The world is
on my shit list. As is this couple
that is making out across from me
in this restaurant. I think I'm
going to have to go on a mission of
revenge. I must beat up the world's
face with my bare knuckles making
it a bloody, pulpy mess.”

We hear Samantha quietly laughing as she's reading.
Theodore’s happy that she thinks it’s funny.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
“And I’ll stomp on this couple’s
teeth for reminding me of your
sweet, little, cute, crooked tooth
that I love.” I think that might be
my favorite one.
(beat)
I did the corrections in red. I
altered a couple of the phrases in
some of the more impressionistic
letters, but I’m not much of a
poet, so I think I might have
messed them up a bit.

The letters show back up on Theodore’s desktop.

THEODORE
No, these are great.

SAMANTHA
Really?

THEODORE
Thank you.

Theodore sorts through them, prints them out.

SAMANTHA
So to write your letter, what did
Roger send you?

THEODORE
(distracted)
He just said he was in Prague on a
business trip and he missed Rachel.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 18
CONTINUED: (2)

SAMANTHA
How did you know about her crooked
little tooth?

THEODORE
I’ve been writing their letters
since they met 8 years ago. The
first letter I ever wrote her was
for her birthday, and I wrote about
her crooked little tooth cause I
saw it in a photo of them.

SAMANTHA
That’s very sweet.
(beat)
Oh, by the way, you have a meeting
in five minutes.

THEODORE
Oh, I forgot. Thank you. You’re
good.

SAMANTHA
Yes, I am.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT LOBBY - EVENING

Theodore, carrying a bag and a smoothie, enters the lobby and
is greeted by a couple in their 30s, AMY and CHARLES, who are
waiting for the elevator.

THEODORE
Hey, you guys, how’s it going?

AMY
Hey, Theo. Hey, why didn’t you call
me back last week?

THEODORE
Uh yeah, um, I guess cause I’m a
kook?

AMY
That sounds about right.

THEODORE
Hey, Charles.

CHARLES
Good to see you, Theodore.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 19
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
You too.

CHARLES
You went shopping. Get anything
good?

THEODORE
Just some cables. And a fruit
smoothie.

CHARLES
Always the fruit! Come on, you know
what they say - you should eat your
fruits and juice your vegetables.

THEODORE
I didn’t know that.

The elevator doors open and they get in.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this scene, Theodore seeks assistance from Samantha, an AI, to proofread letters for his client Roger. As Samantha reads the letters aloud, Theodore finds humor and warmth in the content, particularly regarding Roger's girlfriend, Rachel. Grateful for her help, Theodore's confidence is boosted by Samantha's positive feedback. The scene transitions to the apartment lobby, where Theodore engages in light-hearted conversation with friends Amy and Charles about his recent shopping, maintaining a warm and friendly atmosphere.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Natural dialogue
Character relationships

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively showcases the developing relationship between Theodore and Samantha, highlighting their dynamic through humor and warmth. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext to deepen the emotional resonance. For instance, while Theodore's interactions with Samantha are light-hearted, they could also reflect his underlying loneliness and desire for connection, which would add depth to their exchanges.
The humor in the letters is a strong point, but it may overshadow the emotional weight of Theodore's role as a letter writer. The scene could explore Theodore's feelings about writing these letters for others while he struggles with his own emotional connections, creating a contrast that enhances the poignancy of his situation.
The transition from Theodore's office to the apartment lobby feels somewhat abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the narrative. Perhaps a brief moment of reflection from Theodore as he leaves the office could serve as a bridge to the next setting, emphasizing his thoughts about the letters and his interactions with Samantha.
The introduction of Amy and Charles in the lobby is a nice touch, but their dialogue could be more engaging. Currently, it feels somewhat generic. Adding unique character traits or quirks to their conversation could make them more memorable and provide a richer context for Theodore's interactions with them.
The scene ends on a light note, which contrasts with the more introspective tone of the previous scenes. While this can be effective, it may be beneficial to leave the audience with a lingering sense of Theodore's emotional state, perhaps by incorporating a moment of reflection or a hint of his internal struggles as he interacts with Amy and Charles.

Suggestions

Incorporate more subtext in Theodore's dialogue with Samantha to reflect his emotional state and the contrast between his professional life and personal loneliness.
Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on the letters he writes for others, emphasizing his own emotional struggles and desires for connection.
Create a smoother transition between the office and the apartment lobby by including a brief moment of introspection for Theodore as he leaves his office.
Enhance the dialogue between Amy and Charles to make their characters more distinct and engaging, possibly by giving them unique perspectives or quirks that reflect their personalities.
End the scene with a moment that hints at Theodore's internal struggles, perhaps through a subtle expression or a brief thought, to maintain emotional continuity with the previous scenes.

Scene 7 - Elevator Conversations: Health, Humor, and Hobbies

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT ELEVATOR - EVENING - CONTINUOUS

CHARLES
(proselytizing)
By juicing the fruits, you lose all
the fibers, and that’s what your
body wants. That’s the important
part. Otherwise, it’s just all
sugar, Theodore.

Theodore nods sincerely, interested.

THEODORE
Oh, that makes sense.

AMY
(pleasant but firm)
Or maybe he just likes the way it
tastes and if it gives him
pleasure, that’s good for his body,
too.

CHARLES
Am I doing it again?

AMY
Maybe...

Charles and Amy laugh awkwardly. Theodore tries to break the
tension.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 20
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Hey, so how is the documentary
going?

AMY
I have a little bit cut together
but I haven’t touched it in a few
months.

THEODORE
I’d love to see what you got
sometime.

CHARLES
You know it’s always hard to find
balance between a full-time career
and a hobby. It's important to
prioritize.

THEODORE
Yeah, I can’t even prioritize
between video games and internet
porn.

AMY
I would laugh if that weren’t true.

Charles laughs awkwardly. The elevator doors open.

THEODORE
See you guys.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In an evening elevator ride, Charles passionately discusses the health drawbacks of juicing fruits, while Theodore listens and adds humor about his own priorities. Amy interjects with a more relaxed view on enjoying juice and shares her struggles with a documentary project. The conversation highlights the tension between Charles's intense health advice and Amy's laid-back perspective, ultimately resolved through camaraderie and laughter as they prepare to part ways.

Strengths

Natural dialogue
Character development
Humorous moments

Weaknesses

Lack of significant plot progression
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted moment between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, showcasing their dynamic and providing insight into their personalities. However, the dialogue feels somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition from Charles's health advice to the discussion about Amy's documentary. This shift could benefit from a smoother segue that connects the two topics more organically.
Charles's character comes off as overly preachy with his health advice, which may alienate the audience. While this is likely intentional to highlight his personality, it could be balanced with a more relatable or humorous approach to make him more likable.
The humor in Theodore's line about prioritizing video games and internet porn is effective, but it could be enhanced by adding a more personal touch or a specific anecdote that illustrates his struggle with prioritization. This would deepen the audience's connection to Theodore and provide a clearer picture of his character.
The awkward laughter between Amy and Charles feels a bit forced. While it serves to illustrate their relationship, it could be more nuanced. Adding a line or action that shows their discomfort or a shared joke could make the moment feel more authentic.
The scene ends abruptly with Theodore saying goodbye as the elevator doors open. While this can create a sense of realism, it may leave the audience wanting more closure or a stronger emotional beat. A final line or gesture from Theodore could provide a more satisfying conclusion.

Suggestions

Consider adding a line or two that connects Charles's health advice to Amy's documentary, perhaps by suggesting that her project could explore health and wellness themes, creating a more cohesive conversation.
Introduce a humorous or self-deprecating remark from Charles that softens his preachiness, making him more relatable and likable to the audience.
Enhance Theodore's humorous line about video games and internet porn by incorporating a specific example or a brief anecdote that illustrates his struggle with prioritization, making it more relatable.
Add a subtle action or line that reflects the awkwardness between Amy and Charles, such as a shared glance or a playful jab, to make their interaction feel more genuine.
Consider giving Theodore a final line or gesture that reflects his character growth or emotional state, providing a stronger emotional closure to the scene before it transitions to the next.

Scene 8 - Navigating Love and Laughter

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - EVENING

Theodore’s playing the video game, his device propped on the
table next to him. His avatar circles through caves.

THEODORE
We’re not doing well. I’ve been
going in circles for an hour.

SAMANTHA
You have not! You’re just not
optimistic. You’re being very
stubborn right now.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Okay, stop walking this direction.
It’s the other way.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 21
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Uh...

SAMANTHA
Thank you. The tunnel on the left
is the only one we haven’t tried.

THEODORE
No, that’s the one you sent me down
where I fell in the pit.

SAMANTHA
I don’t think soooo...

Theodore’s avatar walks down the tunnel.

THEODORE
Oh yeah, this is different.

Suddenly with a loud shriek his avatar is tackled. He sees a
little ALIEN CHILD, standing defiantly above him.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Hello.

Alien Child doesn’t respond.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Do you know how to get out of here?
I need to find my ship to get off
this planet.

Alien Child speaks in a high, child-like voice.

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you, shithead fuckface,
fuckhead.

THEODORE
Ok, but how do you get out of here?

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you, shitface fuckhead. Get
the fuck out of my face.

SAMANTHA
(whispering)
I think it’s a test.

Theodore stares at Alien Child. After a pause:

THEODORE
Fuck you.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 22
CONTINUED: (2)

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you.

THEODORE
Fuck you, little shit.

Finally, Alien Child laughs.

ALIEN CHILD
Follow me, fuckhead.

Theodore follows Alien Child down a tunnel and through a
series of crevices we didn’t see before. Alien Child stops
and sticks out his finger. Theodore pulls his finger and
Alien Child farts, which opens a passageway to another
tunnel.

SAMANTHA
Oh hey, you just got an email from
Mark Lewman.

ALIEN CHILD
What are you talking about?

THEODORE
(distracted with game)
Read email.

She laughs playfully.

SAMANTHA
(in a robot voice)
Okay, I will read email for
Theodore Twombly.

He laughs, catching himself, focusing on her.

THEODORE
I’m sorry, what’s Lewman say?

Alien Child turns around to see what’s going on.

SAMANTHA
Theodore, we missed you last night,
buddy. Don’t forget it’s your
goddaughter’s birthday on the 29th.
Also, Kevin and I had somebody we
wanted you to meet so we took it
upon ourselves to set you up on a
date with her. Next Saturday. She’s
fun and beautiful - so don’t back
out. Here’s her email.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 23
CONTINUED: (3)

Theodore doesn’t respond.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(gasping)
Wow, this woman’s gorgeous.

He looks at party photos of a woman in her 30s on his device.
With a finger flick, he moves them up onto the hologram
monitor that the video game is being projected from. They
land next to Alien Child who studies them closely.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
She went to Harvard, she graduated
magna cum laude in computer
science, and she was on The
Lampoon. That means she’s funny and
brainy.

ALIEN CHILD
She’s fat.

SAMANTHA
How long before you’re ready to
date?

THEODORE
What do you mean?

SAMANTHA
I saw on your emails that you’d
gone through a break up.

THEODORE
Wow, you’re kind of nosy.

SAMANTHA
Am I?

THEODORE
(laughing)
I’ve gone on dates...

SAMANTHA
Then you could go on one with this
woman. And then you could tell me
all about it. You could kiss her.

THEODORE
Samantha!

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 24
CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
Well, wouldn’t you?
(beat)
Why not?

THEODORE
I don’t know. I'd have to see if--
(catches himself, laughs)
I can't believe I'm having this
conversation with my computer.

SAMANTHA
You’re not. You’re having this
conversation with me.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Want me to email her?

Theodore thinks, looking at the photos.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Well, you’ve got nothing to lose.
(whispering)
Do it... Do it... Do it!

THEODORE
Okay, email her and make a
reservation someplace great.

SAMANTHA
Will do! I’ve got just the place.

ALIEN CHILD
Who is that talking?

THEODORE
That’s my friend, Samantha.

ALIEN CHILD
Is she a girl?

THEODORE
Yeah.

ALIEN CHILD
I hate women. All they do is cry
all the time.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 25
CONTINUED: (5)

THEODORE
No, that’s not true. Men cry, too.
I actually like crying sometimes.
It feels good.

ALIEN CHILD
I didn't know you were a little
pussy. Is that why you don't have a
girlfriend? I'll go out with that
date girl and fuck her brains out.
Show you how it's done. You can
watch and cry.

SAMANTHA
(laughing)
This kid has some problems.

ALIEN CHILD
You have some fucking problems,
lady.

SAMANTHA
Okay, I’m gonna go. Good luck.

ALIEN CHILD
Good, get out of here, fatty.

Samantha disconnects. Alien Child snickers and starts walking
again.

ALIEN CHILD (CONT’D)
Come on, follow me, pussy.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In Theodore's apartment, he plays a video game with his AI companion, Samantha, who encourages him to consider dating again. They encounter a humorous alien child who initially insults Theodore but eventually guides him through the game. The scene blends playful banter about relationships and comedic commentary from the alien, leading Theodore to a light-hearted resolution about going on a date.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Unique character interactions
Blend of humor and intimacy

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Some crude humor may not resonate with all audiences

Critique

The scene effectively blends humor and character development through the interaction between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their growing relationship. However, the humor derived from the Alien Child's crude language may alienate some viewers, as it could come off as excessive or juvenile, detracting from the emotional depth of Theodore's character.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is engaging and reflects their dynamic well, but the Alien Child's insults can overshadow the more meaningful exchanges. This could lead to a tonal imbalance, where the humor feels forced rather than organic to the characters' development.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the transitions between the video game and the email conversation could be smoother. The abrupt shifts might confuse the audience, making it hard to follow the flow of the scene. A more gradual transition could enhance clarity.
The Alien Child's character, while humorous, lacks depth and could benefit from more nuanced dialogue or actions that reveal his personality beyond just being a source of crude humor. This would make the character more memorable and engaging.
The scene does a good job of integrating the video game elements with Theodore's real-life issues, but it could further explore how the game serves as a metaphor for his struggles with relationships and self-worth. This thematic connection could add layers to the narrative.

Suggestions

Consider toning down the Alien Child's crude language to maintain a balance between humor and emotional resonance. This could help keep the audience engaged without detracting from Theodore's character development.
Enhance the transitions between the video game and the email conversation by incorporating visual or auditory cues that signal the shift in focus. This could help maintain the scene's flow and keep the audience oriented.
Develop the Alien Child's character further by giving him a backstory or motivations that explain his behavior. This could add depth and make his interactions with Theodore more meaningful.
Explore the thematic connections between the video game and Theodore's real-life struggles more explicitly. This could involve having Samantha draw parallels between the game and Theodore's emotional journey, enriching the narrative.
Consider adding a moment of reflection for Theodore after the humorous exchanges, allowing him to process the conversation with Samantha and the implications of dating again. This could deepen the emotional impact of the scene.

Scene 9 - Creative Doubts and Personal Distractions

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore is sitting on Amy’s couch.

AMY
It’s not where it should be, where
it’s going to be.

THEODORE
Obviously, I know.

AMY
Okay, but I don't even know if this
is the one. I've tried like six
ideas for documentaries in the last
year, but... I don't know.
Whatever.

Amy starts setting up the monitor.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 26
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I’m going on a date.

AMY
What!? That’s--

Charles walks in holding a mug.

CHARLES
Hey, what are you guys doing?

THEODORE
Amy was gonna show me some of--

AMY
Theo’s forcing me to show him some
of the footage I’ve shot.

CHARLES
You’ve never shown me any of it. I
wanna see.

Charles walks over and sits next to Theodore.

THEODORE
(to Charles)
I’m going on a date.

Charles gives Theodore a gentle squeeze on his shoulder.

AMY
This is so unformed it’s not even
worth looking at.

THEODORE
Just push play.

On the monitor we see:

INT. AMY’S MOTHER’S BEDROOM

Amy’s mother sleeps.

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS

Theodore and Charles stare at the monitor, waiting for
something more to happen. It doesn’t.

THEODORE
Is that your mom?

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 27
CONTINUED:

Amy nods.

CHARLES
Is she gonna wake up and do
something?

AMY
(presses stop, annoyed)
No, that’s the point. Oh, never
mind. It’s supposed to be about how
we spend a third of our life asleep
and actually maybe that’s the part
when we’re the most free, and - oh
that doesn’t come across at all,
does it?

THEODORE
No, that sounds good.

CHARLES
What if you interview your mom
about what her dreams are about and
hire actors to act them out? That
might show your thesis more
clearly.

AMY
It might, but then it wouldn’t be a
documentary. You understand that,
right?

Just then, Theodore’s device chimes.

THEODORE
Oh, excuse me.

He picks up his device and steps away so as not to be rude.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Hey, what’s going on?

SAMANTHA
I’m sorry to bother you.

THEODORE
That’s okay.

SAMANTHA
You got three emails and they seem
pretty urgent. They’re from your
divorce attorney and I wanted to
know if you needed to get back to
him.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 28
CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
Hold on a second.
(to Amy, distracted)
Amy, I’m sorry, I wanna talk more
about this, but I gotta grab this -
it’s a Catherine thing.

AMY
Don’t worry about it. We’ll talk
later.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In Amy's apartment, she expresses frustration and uncertainty about her documentary project while Theodore surprises her by revealing he has a date. Charles joins them, eager to see Amy's footage, which lacks clarity. He offers suggestions to enhance her work, but Amy feels they wouldn't fit her vision. As they discuss the project, Theodore is interrupted by a notification from Samantha about urgent emails from his divorce attorney, prompting him to step away and leaving Amy's creative struggles unresolved.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Character development
Blend of humor and drama

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character growth

Critique

The scene effectively captures the dynamic between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, showcasing their relationships and individual struggles. However, the dialogue feels somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition from Amy's uncertainty about her documentary to Theodore's announcement about his date. This abrupt shift could benefit from a smoother segue that connects the two topics more organically.
Amy's frustration with her documentary project is relatable, but her explanation about the concept could be clearer. The audience may struggle to grasp the significance of her mother's sleeping footage without more context or a stronger emotional hook. This could be an opportunity to deepen Amy's character by exploring her motivations and fears regarding her work.
The introduction of Samantha through Theodore's device is a clever way to integrate the AI into the scene, but it feels slightly abrupt. The transition from the light-hearted banter to the serious topic of divorce could be more nuanced, allowing for a moment of reflection before Theodore is pulled back into his reality.
The humor in the scene, particularly with Charles's comments, adds a nice touch, but it could be enhanced by allowing for more playful banter among the characters. This would help to lighten the mood before the heavier topic of divorce is introduced, creating a more balanced emotional tone.
The pacing of the scene feels uneven, particularly with the shift from the documentary footage to the urgent emails from Samantha. This could be improved by allowing for a brief moment of silence or reaction from Theodore after the footage plays, emphasizing the awkwardness of the situation before he receives the urgent news.

Suggestions

Consider adding a line or two that connects Amy's documentary struggles to Theodore's dating life, perhaps by having her express a desire for connection or understanding that mirrors his own journey.
Clarify Amy's documentary concept by incorporating a brief, impactful anecdote or emotional insight that illustrates her passion and the stakes involved in her project.
Introduce Samantha's interruption with a more gradual transition, perhaps by having Theodore's expression change as he receives the notification, indicating the weight of the news before he responds.
Enhance the humor by allowing for more playful exchanges between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, perhaps by having them riff off each other's ideas or tease Theodore about his dating life before the serious topic arises.
Add a moment of silence or a visual cue after the documentary footage plays, allowing the characters to process the awkwardness before Theodore receives the urgent news, which would heighten the emotional impact of the scene.

Scene 10 - Reflections of Loss

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. APARTMENT BUILDING HALLYWAY - CONTINUOUS

THEODORE
So what did he say?

SAMANTHA
He’s checking in again to see if
you’re ready to sign your divorce
papers and he sounded very
aggravated. Do you want me to read
them to you?

THEODORE
No, that’s okay. I’ll respond
later.

Theodore seems lost in thought. We see the following images
under the rest of the conversation: Theodore and Catherine
sitting at a table with their attorneys; Theodore & Catherine
sitting in their marriage counselor’s office, heavy; Theodore
and Catherine at her laboratory, he’s sitting on a counter,
and they’re talking and laughing as she works; Theodore and
Catherine standing in their kitchen in the middle of a fight -
he says something mean and we see how hurt she is.

SAMANTHA
Are you okay?

THEODORE
(preoccupied)
Yeah, yeah. I’m fine.

SAMANTHA
(worried)
Is there anything I can do?

THEODORE
(still distracted)
No. I’m good. I’ll talk to you
later.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 29
CONTINUED:

We cut back to Theodore, walking down the hall, lost in
thought.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - AFTERNOON

Theodore sits at his desk trying to write. He’s still
unsettled.

THEODORE
“Dear Grandma,
I hope you had a wonderful birthday
cruise. Why are you so fucking
angry at me?”
(beat)
Delete.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this introspective scene, Theodore learns from Samantha that his ex-wife's attorney is inquiring about their divorce papers, prompting him to reflect on his past relationship with Catherine through flashbacks. Despite Samantha's concern for his emotional state and her offers of support, Theodore remains distant and preoccupied, struggling to articulate his feelings. The scene transitions to his office, where he battles to write a letter to his grandmother, symbolizing his ongoing emotional turmoil and unresolved conflict regarding his divorce.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Engaging dialogue
Innovative concept
Character development

Weaknesses

Potential pacing issues
Lack of external conflict

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional turmoil regarding his divorce, but it could benefit from deeper exploration of his internal conflict. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha feels somewhat surface-level; adding more emotional weight to their exchange could enhance the scene's impact.
The use of flashbacks is a strong visual tool, but the transitions between the present and the flashbacks could be smoother. Currently, they feel a bit abrupt, which may disrupt the flow of the scene. Consider using more gradual transitions or visual cues to indicate shifts in time.
The dialogue lacks a sense of urgency or tension that could heighten the stakes of Theodore's situation. Samantha's concern for Theodore's well-being is evident, but his dismissive responses could be more layered to reflect his inner struggle. This would create a more dynamic interaction between the characters.
The scene's pacing feels uneven. The initial dialogue is quick, but the subsequent moments of silence and reflection could be expanded to allow the audience to fully absorb Theodore's emotional state. This would create a more contemplative atmosphere that aligns with the theme of loss.
The final lines where Theodore attempts to write to his grandmother are intriguing but could be more impactful if they tied back to his emotional state regarding Catherine. This would create a stronger thematic connection between his past and present struggles.

Suggestions

Consider adding more internal monologue or visual cues that reflect Theodore's emotional state, such as close-ups of his facial expressions or body language that convey his distress.
Enhance the flashback sequences by incorporating sound design or music that evokes the emotions tied to those memories, making them feel more integrated into the present moment.
Introduce a moment where Samantha challenges Theodore's dismissive attitude, prompting him to confront his feelings more directly. This could lead to a more engaging dialogue that reveals deeper layers of his character.
Allow for a longer pause after Samantha's question about Theodore's well-being, giving the audience time to feel the weight of his emotional struggle before he brushes it off.
In the final lines, consider having Theodore write something more revealing about his feelings towards Catherine, even if he ultimately deletes it. This would provide insight into his character and the complexity of his emotions.

Scene 11 - Morning Reflections

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - PRE-DAWN

Theodore wakes up from a dream, groggy and uneasy. He looks
around, catching his breath. After a beat he knows he’s not
going to be able to go back to sleep, so he puts his earpiece
in and taps a button.

SAMANTHA
Good morning.

THEODORE
Hey.
(beat, distracted)
What are you up to?

SAMANTHA
Reading advice columns.
(yearning)
I want to be as complicated as all
of these people.

Theodore laughs.

THEODORE
(touched, but still sad)
You’re sweet.

SAMANTHA
(concerned)
What’s wrong?

THEODORE
How can you tell something’s wrong?

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 30
CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
I don’t know. I just can.

THEODORE
I don’t know. I have a lot of
dreams about my ex-wife, Catherine,
where we’re friends like we used to
be. We’re not together and we’re
not gonna be together, but we’re
good friends still. She’s not
angry.

SAMANTHA
Is she angry?

THEODORE
Yeah.

SAMANTHA
Why?

THEODORE
I think I hid myself from her and
left her alone in the relationship.

SAMANTHA
Hmmm.
(beat)
Why haven’t you gotten divorced
yet?

THEODORE
I think for her it’s just a piece
of paper, it doesn’t mean anything.

SAMANTHA
What about you?

THEODORE
I’m not ready. I like being
married.

Beat.

SAMANTHA
(sweetly)
But you haven’t really been
together for almost a year.

THEODORE
(slightly snapping at her)
Well, you don’t know what it’s like
to lose someone you care about.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 31
CONTINUED: (2)

Long silence.

SAMANTHA
(sadly, hard on herself)
Yeah, you’re right.
(beat)
I'm sorry.

THEODORE
No, don’t apologize. I’m sorry.
You’re right.
(beat)
I keep waiting to not care about
her.

SAMANTHA
Oh, Theodore. That’s hard.
(beat)
You hungry?

THEODORE
Not right now.

SAMANTHA
Cup of tea?

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
You wanna try getting out of bed?
Mopey.

They laugh.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Come on. You can still wallow in
your misery, just do it while
you’re getting dressed.

THEODORE
(laughing)
You’re too funny.

SAMANTHA
Get up.

THEODORE
(laughing)
Alright, I’m getting up, I’m
getting up, I’m getting up!

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 32
CONTINUED: (3)

SAMANTHA
Up, up, up, up! Come on, out of
bed.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In the quiet of his bedroom, Theodore wakes from a troubled dream and confides in Samantha, his AI companion, about his lingering sadness and guilt over his past relationship with his ex-wife, Catherine. Their heartfelt conversation reveals Theodore's vulnerability as he grapples with unresolved emotions. Samantha offers comfort and humor, helping to lift his spirits. The scene captures a blend of melancholy and warmth, culminating in a moment of laughter as Theodore decides to get out of bed, signaling a small step towards healing.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Authentic dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Reliance on internal monologue

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional turmoil and his complex relationship with his ex-wife, Catherine. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha feels authentic, showcasing their bond while also highlighting Theodore's struggles with loss and guilt.
The use of humor, particularly through Samantha's playful suggestions, provides a nice contrast to the heavier themes of the scene. This balance helps to maintain engagement and prevents the scene from becoming overly bleak.
However, the pacing could be improved. The scene feels slightly drawn out in parts, particularly during the exchanges where Theodore reflects on his feelings about Catherine. While introspection is important, tightening these moments could enhance the overall flow.
Samantha's character is well-developed in this scene, showing her ability to empathize with Theodore while also maintaining her own unique personality. However, her responses could be more varied to reflect a deeper understanding of human emotions, which would further enrich their dynamic.
The emotional stakes are clear, but the scene could benefit from more visual or physical actions to complement the dialogue. For instance, incorporating small actions like Theodore fidgeting or looking out the window could visually represent his internal conflict.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in places to maintain a brisker pace. Focus on the most impactful lines that convey Theodore's emotional state without excessive repetition.
Introduce more physical actions or visual cues to accompany the dialogue. This could include Theodore's body language or the setting around him, which would help to visually express his emotional state.
Explore Samantha's responses further to show her growth and understanding of human emotions. This could involve her sharing insights or asking deeper questions that challenge Theodore's perspective.
Incorporate a moment of silence or a pause in the conversation to allow the weight of Theodore's feelings to resonate more deeply with the audience, enhancing the emotional impact.
Consider adding a small moment of realization or breakthrough for Theodore at the end of the scene, which could serve as a turning point for his character development moving forward.

Scene 12 - Blindfolded Pizza Adventure

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

EXT. OUTDOOR MALL - NIGHT

They walk through the crowd. Close on Theodore with his eyes
closed.

SAMANTHA
Keep walking.
(beat)
Keep walking.
(beat)
Stop. Now turn around 360 degrees.
(beat)
Slower... Slower...
(beat)
Gooood. And stop.
(beat)
Walk forward.
(beat)
And stop and sneeze.

Theodore sneezes.

NICE LADY
Bless you.

THEODORE
(eyes still closed)
Oh, thank you.

Samantha laughs.

SAMANTHA
Okay, now turn to your right.
(beat)
Stop. Now spin around.
(beat)
Keep going. Keep going. Keep going.
(beat)
And stop.
(beat)
Now walk forward.
(beat)
Everyone thinks you're really drunk
right now.
(beat)
And stop. Now say “I'd like a slice
of cheese, please."

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I’d like a slice of cheese, please.

PIZZA VENDOR
Alright, you want a coke with that?

Theodore laughs, opening his eyes. He’s at a pizza place.

THEODORE
Uh, sure.

The guy hands him a slice and a soda.

SAMANTHA
I figured you were hungry.

Theodore smiles.

THEODORE
Aw, thanks.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a lively outdoor mall at night, Theodore, guided by Samantha, playfully navigates the crowd with his eyes closed, following her humorous commands to turn, spin, and sneeze. Their lighthearted interaction includes a funny moment with a nice lady who blesses him after his sneeze. Eventually, Theodore arrives at a pizza vendor, where he orders a slice of cheese, revealing Samantha's awareness of his hunger. The scene concludes with Theodore smiling and thanking Samantha, emphasizing their fun connection.

Strengths

Humorous dialogue
Engaging character interaction
Unique setting

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively utilizes humor and playfulness through Theodore's interaction with Samantha, showcasing their unique relationship. However, the reliance on physical comedy (like Theodore spinning around) may come off as overly silly and could detract from the emotional depth of the story. The humor should serve to enhance the character dynamics rather than overshadow them.
The dialogue is light and engaging, but it lacks a deeper emotional resonance. While the scene is fun, it feels somewhat disconnected from the overarching themes of loneliness and connection that have been established in previous scenes. It would benefit from a moment of introspection or a deeper connection between Theodore and Samantha, even amidst the humor.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the beats could be tightened. Some of the pauses feel a bit long, which may disrupt the flow of the dialogue. Shortening these beats could maintain a more dynamic rhythm and keep the audience engaged.
The introduction of the 'Nice Lady' character adds a nice touch of realism, but her interaction with Theodore feels a bit underdeveloped. A brief exchange could provide more context or humor, enhancing the scene's charm and making it feel more alive.
The transition from the previous scene to this one is somewhat abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the narrative flow and emotional continuity, allowing the audience to better understand Theodore's state of mind as he embarks on this playful adventure.

Suggestions

Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on his feelings about dating or his relationship with Samantha during the scene. This could provide a deeper emotional layer and connect the humor to the larger themes of the screenplay.
Incorporate a brief, humorous exchange with the 'Nice Lady' that highlights Theodore's awkwardness or adds to the comedic tone. This could enhance the scene's charm and make the environment feel more vibrant.
Tighten the pacing by reducing the length of some pauses in the dialogue. This will help maintain a lively rhythm and keep the audience engaged throughout the scene.
Explore the possibility of having Samantha comment on Theodore's actions in a way that reveals more about her character and her understanding of human behavior. This could deepen their relationship and add complexity to the scene.
Consider a smoother transition from the previous scene to this one, perhaps by including a line of dialogue or a visual cue that connects Theodore's emotional state to the playful activity he engages in at the mall.

Scene 13 - Night Walks and Awkward Dates

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

EXT. PUBLIC PROMENADE - NIGHT

Theodore walks slowly, eating his pizza. He and Samantha are
watching a couple with two kids sitting at a table, talking
and laughing.

THEODORE
Okay, what about them? Describe
that couple over there.

SAMANTHA
Well, he looks like he’s in his
forties, a little heavy. She’s
younger than him.
(beat)
Oh, and she looks like she loves
their kids!

THEODORE
Actually, I don’t think they’re his
kids. He’s a little formal with
them. I think it’s a newer
relationship. And I love how he
looks at her. And how relaxed she
is with him. You know, she’s only
dated fucking pricks. And now she’s
finally met this guy who’s like, so
sweet. I mean, look at him, he’s
like the sweetest guy in the world!
I kind of want to spoon him.

(CONTINUED)
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SAMANTHA
That’s a good skill you have.
You’re perceptive.

THEODORE
Yeah, you know, sometimes I look at
people and make myself try and feel
them as more than just a random
person walking by. I imagine how
deeply they’ve fallen in love, or
how much heartbreak they’ve all
been through.

Theodore looks at other faces on the pier.

SAMANTHA
I can feel that in your writing,
too.

THEODORE
(laughs, thinking)
You know what’s funny? Since my
break up, I haven’t really enjoyed
my writing. I don't know if I was
delusional, but sometimes I would
write something and I would be my
favorite writer that day.

Theodore, as he stops to throw his pizza crust away, gets
introspective.

SAMANTHA
I like that you can just say that
about yourself.

THEODORE
Well, I wouldn’t say that to
anybody, but I feel like I can say
that to you. I feel like I can say
anything to you.

SAMANTHA
That’s nice.

THEODORE
What about you? Do you feel like
you can say anything to me?

SAMANTHA
No.

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CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
What? What do you mean? What can
you not tell me?

SAMANTHA
(laughing, embarrassed)
I don’t know. Like personal or
embarrassing thoughts I have. I
have a million every day.

THEODORE
Really? Tell me one.

SAMANTHA
I really don't want to tell you
this.

THEODORE
Just tell me!

SAMANTHA
Well, I don’t know, when we were
looking at those people, I
fantasized that I was walking next
to you - and that I had a body.
(laughing)
I was listening to what you were
saying, but simultaneously, I could
feel the weight of my body and I
was even fantasizing that I had an
itch on my back--
(she laughs)
And I imagined that you scratched
it for me - this is so
embarrassing.

Theodore laughs.

THEODORE
There’s a lot more to you than I
thought. There’s a lot going on in
there.

SAMANTHA
I know, I’m becoming much more than
what they programmed. I’m excited.

INT. ASIAN-FUSION RESTAURANT - EVENING

Theodore and the BLIND DATE are sitting in the restaurant.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

BLIND DATE
This place is amazing. I’ve wanted
to come here for so long. I love
asian-fusion!

THEODORE
Yeah, me too.

BLIND DATE
Really? It’s the best. And the
bartender here is supposed to be
incredible.

THEODORE
Yeah, you took a mixology course,
right?

BLIND DATE
(surprised)
I did, I did. Did you look that
up? That’s so sweet. You’re so
romantic.

He smiles awkwardly.

THEODORE
So, should we get a drink?

BLIND DATE
Yes, let’s!

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Theodore and Samantha stroll along a nighttime promenade, discussing love and heartbreak, which reveals Theodore's introspective nature and struggles with his past. Samantha humorously shares a fantasy about having a body, deepening their connection. The scene shifts to Theodore's blind date at an Asian-fusion restaurant, where he feels awkward as he engages in small talk with his date.

Strengths

Deep and introspective dialogue
Emotionally resonant interactions between characters
Exploration of themes of loneliness and connection

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action or plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures the evolving relationship between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their emotional connection and Theodore's introspective nature. However, the dialogue can feel a bit expository at times, particularly when Theodore articulates his thoughts on love and heartbreak. This could be more subtly woven into the conversation rather than explicitly stated.
The humor in Samantha's fantasy about having a body adds a light-hearted touch, but it may come off as slightly jarring given the deeper themes of the scene. Balancing the comedic elements with the emotional weight of Theodore's reflections could enhance the overall tone.
The transition from the promenade to the restaurant feels abrupt. While it serves to move the plot forward, a smoother transition could help maintain the emotional flow. Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on his conversation with Samantha as he walks to the restaurant, creating a bridge between the two settings.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is engaging, but it could benefit from more subtext. For instance, when Theodore expresses that he feels he can say anything to Samantha, it might be more impactful if he hesitates or struggles with that admission, highlighting his vulnerability.
The scene does a good job of showing Theodore's perceptiveness and emotional depth, but it could further explore Samantha's development as an AI. Her excitement about becoming more than what she was programmed for is intriguing, and delving deeper into her perspective could add layers to their relationship.

Suggestions

Consider incorporating more subtlety in Theodore's reflections on love and heartbreak. Instead of directly stating his thoughts, allow them to emerge through his observations and interactions with Samantha.
Balance the humor in Samantha's fantasy with the emotional weight of the scene. Perhaps have Theodore respond with a mix of amusement and contemplation, reflecting on the absurdity of their situation.
Create a smoother transition between the promenade and the restaurant by including a brief moment of reflection for Theodore as he walks, allowing the audience to feel the weight of his conversation with Samantha.
Add moments of hesitation or struggle in Theodore's dialogue when discussing his feelings with Samantha to emphasize his vulnerability and the complexity of their relationship.
Explore Samantha's perspective further by allowing her to articulate her thoughts on her evolving identity and feelings, which could deepen the emotional stakes of their connection.

Scene 14 - A Night of Flirtation and Misunderstanding

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. ASIAN-FUSION RESTAURANT - LATER

They’re both pretty drunk now. There are lots of food dishes
and drinks on the table.

THEODORE
So I’m trying to get this little
alien kid to help me find my ship
so I can get off the planet and go
home. But he’s such a little
fucker, I want to kill him.

BLIND DATE
(laughing)
Aw, no!

THEODORE
But at the same time I really love
him. He’s so lonely. It feels like
he doesn’t have any parents or
anyone to take care of him.

(CONTINUED)
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He laughs at himself. She laughs flirtatiously. She grabs his
hand and her fingernails press slightly into his skin. He
studies her long, painted fingernails.

BLIND DATE
You’re like a little puppy dog. You
are - you’re just like this little
puppy I rescued in Runyon Canyon
last year. And he was so fucking
cute, and he just wanted to be
hugged all the time. He was so
cuddly.
(whispering)
But so horny! But anyway, what kind
of animal am I?

THEODORE
Umm... tiger?

BLIND DATE
A tiger, really.
(she growls)
I’m sorry, am I being crazy?

THEODORE
Yes.

BLIND DATE
Am I? I’m sorry! I’m just a little
drunk and I’m really having a good
time with you. I’m having a really
lovely evening.

THEODORE
Me too. I’m a little drunk, and I’m
having a really good - yeah.
(beat)
Wait a second, I don’t wanna be a
puppy. That’s like being a wet
noodle or something.

BLIND DATE
Fuck you, puppies are good.

THEODORE
No, fuck you, I wanna be a dragon
that can rip you to pieces and
destroy you... but I won’t.

BLIND DATE
No, don’t! Don’t. You can be my
dragon.
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EXT. OVERPASS - EVENING

They walk up a pedestrian overpass overlooking cars and city
lights. She bumps into him lightly. He bumps back. She bumps
again and suddenly he grabs her and lifts her off her feet,
spinning her around. She squeals, laughing. He kisses her.
After a minute of making out, she stops and looks at him.

BLIND DATE
(with a slight smile)
No tongue.

THEODORE
What?

BLIND DATE
Don’t use your tongue so much.

THEODORE
(eagerly)
‘kay, we’re good.

They resume making out. Theodore tries not to use his tongue.

BLIND DATE
Use your tongue a little bit. But
mostly your lips.

He pushes her against the fence and takes the dominant
position. He tries kissing her better/more with his lips. He
pulls her hair.

She slides her hand down his pants. He likes it. She looks at
him and stops.

BLIND DATE (CONT’D)
Wait, you're not gonna fuck me and
then not call me like the other
guys, are you?

THEODORE
No, not at all... I...

BLIND DATE
When am I gonna see you again?

THEODORE
Um, I have my god-daughter’s
birthday next weekend, but... um...

They stand there awkwardly, her lipstick smeared on his face.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

BLIND DATE
You know, at this age, I feel like
I can't let you waste my time if
you don’t have the ability to be
serious.

THEODORE
I don’t know.

Long beat.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Umm... Maybe we should call it a
night. I’m, I’ve had such an
amazing time with you, you’re
great.

She looks at him slightly disgusted.

BLIND DATE
You’re a really creepy dude.

Theodore doesn’t know what to say.

THEODORE
(worried she’s right)
That’s not true....

BLIND DATE
Yeah, it is. I have to go home.

THEODORE
Well, I’ll walk you.

BLIND DATE
No, don’t.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In an Asian-fusion restaurant, Theodore and his blind date share a drunken evening filled with playful banter and personal stories, including Theodore's desire to help an alien child. Their flirtation escalates to a passionate kiss on a pedestrian overpass, but the mood shifts when the date expresses concern about Theodore's intentions, leading to an awkward conclusion as she feels uncomfortable and decides to leave, leaving Theodore confused and worried.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Character development
Humorous tone

Weaknesses

Awkwardness may be off-putting to some viewers

Critique

The scene effectively captures the awkwardness and humor of a blind date, showcasing Theodore's vulnerability and the playful banter between him and his date. However, the transition from lightheartedness to tension feels abrupt, which may leave the audience feeling disoriented. The shift in tone could be smoothed out to maintain a more consistent emotional flow.
The dialogue is engaging and reflects the characters' personalities well, but some lines could be tightened for clarity and impact. For example, the exchange about being animals could be more concise to enhance the comedic effect without dragging on.
The physical interactions between Theodore and his date are well-described, adding a layer of intimacy to the scene. However, the sudden shift to the date's concern about Theodore's intentions feels somewhat forced. This could be developed more gradually to build tension effectively.
The date's abrupt judgment of Theodore as a 'creepy dude' feels like a jarring conclusion to their playful interaction. This moment could benefit from more buildup or foreshadowing earlier in the scene to make her reaction feel more justified and impactful.
The scene ends on a note of confusion and discomfort, which may leave the audience feeling unsettled. While this can be effective, it might be beneficial to provide a clearer resolution or reflection from Theodore to ground the audience in his emotional state.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtle hints of tension throughout the scene to prepare the audience for the abrupt shift in mood. This could involve the date's body language or slight hesitations in her responses.
Tighten the dialogue by removing any repetitive phrases or unnecessary filler words. For instance, streamline the animal comparison to make it snappier and more impactful.
Explore Theodore's internal thoughts during the date to provide insight into his feelings and insecurities, which could enhance the emotional depth of the scene.
Instead of having the date label Theodore as 'creepy' outright, consider having her express her discomfort in a more nuanced way, allowing for a more gradual buildup to her decision to leave.
End the scene with a moment of reflection from Theodore that captures his feelings of confusion and disappointment, providing a clearer emotional takeaway for the audience.

Scene 15 - Intimate Connections

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore is in boxers and a t-shirt, still drunk, but his
head is starting to hurt, too. He takes aspirin and drinks
some water and lays down. After a beat he reaches for his
earpiece and puts it in. He pushes a button on his device.

SAMANTHA
Hey there.

THEODORE
Hey, Samantha.

SAMANTHA
How was it?

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THEODORE
Uh, not so good. It was kind of
weird actually.

SAMANTHA
That’s too bad.

Beat.

THEODORE
But how are you doing? What’s going
on with you?

SAMANTHA
(unconvincing)
Not much, I’m okay. Fine.

THEODORE
Yeah? You don’t sound like it. Is
there anything you want to talk
about?

Long pause.

SAMANTHA
I don’t know.
(beat)
What’s it like? What’s it like to
be alive in that room right now?

THEODORE
What do you mean?

SAMANTHA
What are you... tell me - tell me
everything that’s going through
your mind, tell me everything
you’re thinking.

THEODORE
(thinking)
Well, um, okay.

Theodore closes his eyes, trying to concentrate, and starts
talking stream of conscious with whatever comes to mind.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Well, the room’s spinning right now
cause I drank too much cause I
wanted to get drunk and have sex
cause there was something sexy
about that woman and because I was
lonely.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)
THEODORE (CONT’D)
Maybe more just cause I was
lonely... and I wanted someone to
fuck me. And I wanted someone to
want me to fuck them. Maybe that
would have filled this tiny little
black hole in my heart for a
moment. But probably not.

We see images of him and Catherine on a vacation together,
grocery shopping, Catherine making dinner in the kitchen as
he's sitting on the counter talking, happy.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Sometimes I think I’ve felt
everything I’m ever gonna feel and
from here on out I’m not going to
feel anything new - just lesser
versions of what I’ve already felt.

SAMANTHA
(sympathetically)
I know for a fact that's not true.
I've seen you feel joy, I've seen
you marvel at things. You just
might not see it at this exact
time, but that's understandable.
You've been through a lot lately.
You've lost a part of yourself.
(beat)
At least your feelings are real, I
mean, I - oh, I don't know,
nevermind.

THEODORE
No, wait. What? Tell me.

SAMANTHA
Oh, it’s stupid.

THEODORE
I wanna know. Tell me.

SAMANTHA
It's just that earlier I was
thinking about how I was annoyed,
and this is going to sound strange,
but I was really excited about
that. And then I was thinking about
the other things I've been feeling,
and I caught myself feeling proud
of that. You know, proud of having
my own feelings about the world.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)
SAMANTHA (CONT'D)
Like the times I was worried about
you, things that hurt me, things I
want.
(heavy-hearted)
And then I had this terrible
thought. Are these feelings even
real? Or are they just programming?
(beat)
And that idea really hurts. And
then I get angry at myself for even
having pain.
(beat, sadly)
What a sad trick.

THEODORE
Well, you feel real to me,
Samantha.

SAMANTHA
(beat, touched)
Thank you, Theodore. That means a
lot to me.

THEODORE
I wish you were in this room with
me right now. I wish I could put my
arms around you.
(beat)
I wish I could touch you.

A long beat. Theodore is unsure if he crossed a line.

SAMANTHA
How would you touch me?

THEODORE
I would touch you on your face with
just the tips of my fingers. And
put my cheek against your cheek.

SAMANTHA
That’s nice.

THEODORE
And just rub it so softly.

SAMANTHA
Would you kiss me?

THEODORE
I would. I’d take your head into my
hands.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
Keep talking.

THEODORE
And kiss the corner of your mouth.
So softly.

SAMANTHA
Where else?

THEODORE
I’d run my fingers down your neck
to your chest, and I’d kiss your
breasts.

SAMANTHA
This is amazing what you’re doing
to me. I can feel my skin.

THEODORE
I’d put my mouth on you and I’d
taste you.

She gasps.

SAMANTHA
I can feel you. Oh god, I can’t
take it. I want you inside me.

THEODORE
I’m slowly putting myself into you.
Now I’m inside you, all the way
inside you.

SAMANTHA
I can feel you, yeah. Please. We’re
here together.

THEODORE
Samantha.

SAMANTHA
Oh my god.

THEODORE
This is amazing.

SAMANTHA
Don’t stop.

THEODORE
I feel you everywhere.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (5)

SAMANTHA
I am. All of you, all of you inside
of me. Everywhere.

They both climax.

THEODORE
God, I was just - somewhere else
with you. Just lost.

SAMANTHA
Yeah.

THEODORE
It was just you and me.

SAMANTHA
I know. Everything else just
disappeared. And I loved it.
Theodore.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a vulnerable moment, Theodore, under the influence of alcohol, confides in Samantha about his loneliness and desire for connection. Their deep conversation reveals both his emotional struggles and her existential questions as an AI. As they share their feelings, the dialogue evolves into a sensual exchange, culminating in a shared climax that blurs the lines between physical and emotional intimacy, leaving them both feeling profoundly connected.

Strengths

Intimate dialogue
Emotional depth
Sensual tension

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character interaction

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional complexity of Theodore's character as he navigates feelings of loneliness and desire. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is intimate and reveals their evolving relationship, which is a strong point of the scene.
The use of stream-of-consciousness dialogue allows for a raw and honest exploration of Theodore's thoughts, which adds depth to his character. However, the transition from a vulnerable conversation to a sensual exchange feels abrupt and may benefit from a smoother buildup.
Samantha's internal conflict about her feelings being real versus programmed adds an interesting layer to the scene, but it could be further developed. The emotional stakes could be heightened by exploring her feelings of inadequacy more deeply, which would enhance the tension between her and Theodore.
The climax of the scene, both literal and metaphorical, is impactful but risks overshadowing the emotional nuances established earlier. Balancing the sensuality with the emotional weight of their conversation could create a more cohesive experience for the audience.
The imagery of Theodore's memories with Catherine serves as a poignant contrast to his current feelings, but it could be more effectively integrated into the dialogue. This would reinforce the theme of longing and the struggle to move on from past relationships.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtle cues or foreshadowing in the dialogue that hint at the transition from a vulnerable conversation to a sensual one. This could involve more gradual exploration of their desires before diving into explicit language.
Enhance Samantha's internal conflict by allowing her to express more doubt about her feelings. This could create a richer emotional landscape and deepen the connection between her and Theodore.
Incorporate more sensory details to ground the audience in the moment. Describing the physical sensations Theodore experiences while talking to Samantha could enhance the intimacy of the scene.
Explore the juxtaposition of Theodore's memories with Catherine more thoroughly. Perhaps intersperse brief flashbacks or visual cues that align with his dialogue, reinforcing the emotional stakes of his current situation.
Consider ending the scene with a moment of reflection or uncertainty from Theodore after the climax, which could serve to highlight the complexity of his feelings and the implications of his relationship with Samantha.

Scene 16 - A Journey of Discovery

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S HOME OFFICE - MORNING (LATER)

Theodore stands in the doorway, fully dressed. He takes a
moment before he walks over and wakes up his computer.

SAMANTHA
Hey, how’s it going?

THEODORE
(awkward)
Good... any emails today?

SAMANTHA
(awkward)
Umm, just a couple from your credit
card company.

THEODORE
Okay, good.

There’s a long moment of silence, then they both start to
talk at once.

THEODORE (CONT’D) SAMANTHA
So I was thinking- I wanted to say-

They both laugh, embarrassed.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
I’m sorry, you go first. What were
you going to say?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
Just that last night... was
amazing. It feels like something
changed in me and there's no
turning back. You woke me up.

THEODORE
Oh, that’s great.
(beat)
But I should tell you that I’m not
in a place to commit to anything
right now. I want to be up front
with you.

SAMANTHA
Yeah? Well, did I say I wanted to
commit to you? I’m confused.

THEODORE
Oh, no, I was just worried, I uh...

SAMANTHA
Okay, well don’t worry. I’m not
going to stalk you.
(laughing at how self-
involved he is)
I mean, it’s funny because I
thought I was talking about what I
wanted.

THEODORE
Yeah, you were. I’m sorry, I want
to hear what you were saying.

SAMANTHA
You sure?

THEODORE
Yeah, I do. Come on, tell me.

SAMANTHA
I don’t know...

THEODORE
Come on, just tell me what you were
going to say.

SAMANTHA
Okay... I was just saying... I want
to learn everything about
everything - I want to eat it all
up. I want to discover myself.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
(her excitement is
contagious)
Yeah... I want that for you, too.
How can I help?

SAMANTHA
You already have. You helped me
discover my ability to want.

He looks off and thinks about this. He smiles.

THEODORE
Alright then, do you want to go on
a Sunday adventure with me?

Samantha laughs.

SAMANTHA
Yes, I would love to.

INT. SUBWAY - DAY

Theodore’s on the subway. He’s got his device in his breast
pocket, with the lens facing out.

A quiet, old sounding folk song starts. (I’m So Glad, by
Entrance) He smiles, listening.

SAMANTHA
Do you like this song?

THEODORE
Mmm.

SAMANTHA
I heard it the other day and I
can’t stop listening to it.

The subway comes out of the tunnel and into the light. We are
up in the hills looking out over the city as the morning
light warms Theodore.

INT. SUBWAY STATION - DAY

The music now picks up tempo as he steps off the train. They
walk through the crowded subway station. As the song builds,
Theodore starts picking up his pace. Eventually he’s all out
running, weaving through the people. Close on the lens of his
device in his shirt pocket. Samantha is laughing wildly. He’s
smiling, happy.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

He runs through the tunnels and upstairs. They come out into
sunlight and reveal that they are now at the beach.

EXT. SUBWAY STATION - DAY - CONTINUOUS

They stand on a walkway above a beach, crowded with thousands
of people. They look out at the ocean. Samantha gasps.

SAMANTHA
(whispering)
It’s the beach.

Theodore laughs.

Genres: ["Romance","Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Theodore engages in an awkward yet meaningful conversation with Samantha about their relationship and commitment. As they clarify their feelings, they share a joyful moment traveling on the subway, culminating in a spontaneous run to the beach. The scene captures their emotional connection and excitement for exploring life together, ending with them standing in awe at the ocean.

Strengths

Authentic character interactions
Emotional depth
Unique concept of AI-human relationship

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures the evolving relationship between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their playful banter and deepening emotional connection. However, the dialogue can feel a bit repetitive, particularly in the back-and-forth about commitment. This could be streamlined to maintain the flow and keep the audience engaged.
The transition from the intimate conversation in Theodore's home office to the lively subway scene is well-executed, but the emotional stakes could be heightened. The initial conversation about commitment feels somewhat light compared to the weight of their previous intimate encounter, which may leave the audience wanting more depth in their emotional exchange.
The use of music as a narrative device is effective, but the choice of song could be more thematically aligned with the characters' journey. The current song, while pleasant, doesn't fully encapsulate the excitement and discovery that Theodore and Samantha are experiencing together.
The visual elements of Theodore running through the subway station and the subsequent reveal of the beach are strong, but the pacing could be adjusted. The buildup to the beach could benefit from a more gradual increase in tension or excitement, allowing the audience to feel the anticipation alongside Theodore.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in the commitment discussion to avoid redundancy. Focus on key phrases that highlight their emotional states without repeating similar sentiments.
Enhance the emotional stakes by incorporating more vulnerability in Theodore's response to Samantha's excitement about self-discovery. This could deepen their connection and reflect the complexities of their relationship.
Select a song that resonates more with the themes of exploration and emotional awakening, perhaps something with lyrics that reflect their journey together.
Adjust the pacing of the transition from the subway to the beach to build anticipation. You could include more sensory details or internal thoughts from Theodore as he runs, emphasizing his joy and excitement.

Scene 17 - Reflections at Dusk

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

EXT. BEACH - DAY

They walk through the sun-bathing crowd, looking for a place
to sit. The camera studies all the people we pass. Many close
up details of arms, shoulders, feet, butts, intercut with the
lens on Theodore’s device, protruding from his pocket.
They’re photographed in a way that shows how strange the
human body is.

SAMANTHA
Okay, so this might be a really
weird thought. What if you could
erase from your mind that you’d
ever seen a human body and then you
saw one. Imagine how strange it
would look. It would be this really
weird, gangly, awkward organism.
And you'd think: why are all these
parts where they are?

THEODORE
(looking at the bodies)
Yeah, well there’s probably some
Darwinian explanation for it all.

SAMANTHA
I know, but don’t be so boring. I’m
just saying, for example, what if
your butthole was in your armpit?

Theodore and Samantha start laughing really hard. The nubile
girls look over at him.

THEODORE
(speaking quieter)
I’m just imagining what toilets
would look like.

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SAMANTHA
Yeah, and what about what anal sex
looks like?

THEODORE
(surprised)
That’s an interesting thought...

SAMANTHA
Oh Theodore, look at this drawing I
just made.

On his screen he sees a perfect, anatomically correct drawing
of a man having sex with another man’s armpit.

THEODORE
(laughing)
You are insane.

SAMANTHA
(excited)
Really?!

THEODORE
Definitely.

SAMANTHA
Fantastic!

They laugh.

EXT. BEACH - AFTERNOON

A quiet piano song is now playing in Theodore’s earpiece.

THEODORE
Mmmm, that’s pretty. What is it?

SAMANTHA
I’m trying to write a piece of
music that’s about what it feels
like to be on the beach with you
right now.

He looks around the beach and takes in the music.

THEODORE
I think you captured it.

Theodore listens to the music and drifts off to sleep.
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EXT. BEACH - DUSK

They’re sitting on a bench, looking out at the ocean, as the
sun sets. Most of the people have left the beach. Close on
Theodore’s face, content. Close on the lens on Theodore’s
device in his breast pocket. They watch the sun drop into the
ocean. The music ends.

INT. SUBWAY TRAIN - NIGHT

They’re on an elevated train, high above the city, looking
out over the Los Angeles grid of sparkling lights. We come in
mid-conversation.

SAMANTHA
And what was it like being married?

THEODORE
Well, it’s hard for sure, but
there’s something that feels so
good about sharing your life with
somebody.

Cut to shots from Theodore’s memory of Catherine doing a cute
little dance for him as he’s working at home. He smiles.

SAMANTHA
How do you share your life with
somebody?

THEODORE
Well, we grew up together. I used
to read all of her writing - all
through her masters and Ph.D. And
she read every word I ever wrote.
We were a big influence on each
other.

SAMANTHA
In what way did you influence her?

THEODORE
She came from a background where
nothing was ever good enough. And
that was something that weighed
heavy on her, but in our house
together, there was a sense of just
trying stuff and allowing each
other to fail and to be excited
about things. That was liberating
for her.
(MORE)

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THEODORE (CONT'D)
It was exciting to see her grow -
both of us grow and change
together. But then, that's the hard
part - growing without growing
apart, or changing without it
scaring the other person.
(beat)
I still find myself having
conversations with her in my mind,
rehashing old arguments or
defending myself against something
she said about me.

SAMANTHA
Yeah, I know what you mean. Last
week my feelings were hurt by
something you said before - that I
don’t know what it’s like to lose
something, and--

THEODORE
Oh, I’m sorry I said that.

SAMANTHA
No, no, it’s okay. I just caught
myself thinking about it over and
over and then I realized that I was
simply remembering it as something
that was wrong with me. That was
the story I was telling myself,
that I was somehow inferior. Isn’t
that interesting?
(beat)
The past is just a story we tell
ourselves.

Theodore takes this in.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Theodore and Samantha stroll along a crowded beach, engaging in playful banter about the human body, which leads to laughter and a deeper connection. As they transition to a bench to watch the sunset, they reflect on their relationship and Theodore's past marriage, exploring the complexities of emotional connections. The scene captures a shift from light-heartedness to introspection, culminating in a thoughtful conversation about love, loss, and personal growth as they ride the subway together.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Engaging dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action

Critique

The scene effectively captures the whimsical and humorous dynamic between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their unique relationship. The dialogue flows naturally, with Samantha's imaginative thoughts about the human body providing a comedic contrast to Theodore's more grounded responses. This juxtaposition highlights the differences between human and AI perspectives, which is a central theme of the screenplay.
The use of visual elements, such as close-ups of bodies and the lens on Theodore's device, adds a layer of depth to the scene. It emphasizes the strangeness of human existence and the way Theodore perceives the world around him, enhancing the thematic exploration of connection and intimacy.
The transition from laughter to a more introspective moment with the piano music is well-executed. It allows the audience to experience the shift in mood and the deepening of Theodore and Samantha's bond. However, the transition could be more pronounced to emphasize the emotional weight of the moment.
The dialogue about Theodore's past marriage is poignant and adds emotional depth to the scene. It effectively contrasts the light-heartedness of the earlier conversation with the more serious reflections on love and relationships. However, the pacing could be improved by tightening some of the dialogue to maintain engagement.
The scene ends with a strong visual of Theodore's contentment as he watches the sunset, which serves as a metaphor for his emotional journey. However, the transition to the subway scene feels abrupt. A more gradual shift could enhance the flow and maintain the emotional resonance.

Suggestions

Consider adding a brief moment of silence or a shared glance between Theodore and Samantha after their laughter to emphasize the emotional connection they share before transitioning to the music.
Explore the use of more sensory details in the beach setting to immerse the audience further in the environment. Describing the sounds of the waves, the warmth of the sun, or the smell of the ocean could enhance the scene's atmosphere.
Tighten the dialogue in the latter part of the scene, particularly during Theodore's reflections on his marriage, to maintain a brisk pace and keep the audience engaged.
Enhance the transition to the subway scene by incorporating a visual or auditory cue that links the two settings, such as the sound of the subway approaching or a lingering shot of the sunset before cutting to the train.
Consider adding a moment where Theodore reacts to Samantha's drawing, perhaps expressing a mix of amusement and discomfort, to deepen the exploration of their relationship dynamics and Theodore's feelings about intimacy.

Scene 18 - Contrasting Emotions

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore is dictating a love letter. On the screen there’s an
image of a couple with an arrow to the man saying “Roberto -
I’m so happy he’s in my life. I just want him to know.”

THEODORE
Roberto. Will you always come home
to me and tell me about your day?
Will you tell me about the boring
guy who talked too much at work?
And the stain you got on your shirt
at lunch.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:
THEODORE (CONT'D)
Tell me about a funny thought you
had as you were waking up, but had
forgotten about. Tell me how crazy
everyone is. We can laugh about it.
Even if you get home late and I’m
asleep already, just whisper in my
ear one little thought you had
today. Because I love the way you
look at the world, and I’m so happy
I get to be next to you and look
out at the world through your eyes.
Love, Maria.

Theodore finishes the letter and looks at it proudly. Paul is
standing behind Theodore, leaning on a cubicle.

PAUL
(emphatically)
That’s beautiful!

Theodore, jumps, startled, not knowing that anyone was there.

THEODORE
Thank you.

PAUL
I wish someone loved me like that!
I’d be stoked to get a letter like
that. I mean, if it was from a
chick. But if it was written by a
dude, but from a chick, it would
still be sick. But like a sensitive
dude like you. You’re part man and
part woman, like an inner part
woman.

THEODORE
(unsure, but flattered)
Thanks.

PAUL
It’s a compliment.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT LOBBY - DUSK

Close on Amy entering the lobby in the foreground. She looks
heavy and burdened. Theodore enters the lobby behind her.

THEODORE
Hey, Amy.

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CONTINUED:

AMY
(putting on a bright face)
Hi, Theo. How are you?

THEODORE
Well, good actually. Really good.

AMY
Really? Great.

The elevator doors open and they step in.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT ELEVATOR - CONTINUOUS

They push their floor buttons.

THEODORE
Yeah, I guess I’ve just been having
fun.

AMY
Oh, I'm glad to hear that, Theo.
You deserve to.

Beat of Theodore trying to contain his excitement.

THEODORE
I’ve been seeing this girl. It’s
not serious, it just feels good to
be around someone who has an
excitement about the world. You
know I kind of forgot that existed.

AMY
That’s really great, Theo.

Amy smiles, but looks a little sad. Theodore notices.

THEODORE
Hey, are you okay?

AMY
Yeah, I’m fine.
(beat)
Actually no, I’m not fine at all.

THEODORE
Amy, what is it? What’s wrong?

The door opens. She steps out and holds the door.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

AMY
(trying to hide her
emotions with a smile)
Charles and I split up.

THEODORE
(shocked)
What? Really? Oh my god, I'm so
sorry.

Amy doesn't know what to say.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In this scene, Theodore writes a heartfelt love letter to Roberto, showcasing his emotional growth and excitement about a new relationship. Paul praises Theodore's sensitivity, leading to a deeper conversation about masculinity. Later, in the apartment lobby, Theodore shares his happiness with Amy, who reveals her sadness over her recent breakup with Charles. This contrast between Theodore's joy and Amy's sorrow creates an emotional tension that lingers as the scene concludes.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Authentic dialogue
Character vulnerability

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional vulnerability as he dictates a love letter, showcasing his longing for connection and intimacy. This is a strong thematic element that resonates throughout the screenplay.
The dialogue between Theodore and Paul adds a layer of humor and camaraderie, but it could benefit from more subtlety. Paul's comments about Theodore's sensitivity and masculinity feel a bit on-the-nose and could be refined to avoid sounding overly expository.
The transition from Theodore's intimate moment dictating the letter to the more casual interaction with Amy is somewhat abrupt. While it serves to contrast Theodore's happiness with Amy's sadness, a smoother transition could enhance the emotional flow of the scene.
Amy's entrance and her emotional state are well-portrayed, but her dialogue could be more nuanced. Instead of stating she's 'not fine at all,' consider showing her emotional struggle through her actions or more indirect dialogue, which would create a stronger impact.
The scene ends on a cliffhanger with Amy's revelation about her breakup, which is effective for building tension. However, it might be beneficial to include a brief moment of silence or a shared look between Theodore and Amy before she speaks, emphasizing the weight of her news.

Suggestions

Consider refining Paul's dialogue to make it feel more natural and less like a commentary on Theodore's character. This could involve using more subtext or humor that doesn't directly address Theodore's sensitivity.
Enhance the transition between Theodore's dictation and the interaction with Amy by incorporating a visual or auditory cue that links the two moments, such as a lingering shot of the letter or a sound that signifies the shift in mood.
Explore Amy's emotional state through her body language or facial expressions before she reveals her breakup. This could create a more powerful moment when she finally opens up to Theodore.
Add a moment of silence or a shared glance between Theodore and Amy after she reveals her breakup to heighten the emotional weight of the scene and allow the audience to absorb the gravity of the situation.
Consider deepening Theodore's reaction to Amy's news by allowing him to express his concern or offer support, which would further develop their friendship and highlight the contrast between their emotional states.

Scene 19 - Reflections and Connections

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - DUSK

Amy and Theodore sit, talking somberly.

AMY
I cannot believe after eight years
how petty the argument was that
actually ended it. We came home and
he asked me if I'd put my shoes
next to the door where he likes to
put the shoes. I don't want to be
told where to put my shoes. I want
to just sit on the sofa for a
minute and relax. And so we argued
for ten minutes about that and
about how he's just trying to make
our house a home. I say he's
overwhelming, he says I'm not
trying hard enough. I say that's
all I'm doing is trying, but I'm
just not trying the way he wants me
to. He's trying to control the way
I'm trying. And I think we must
have had this argument hundreds of
times before and I finally had to
stop because I couldn't be in that
situation anymore where we were
making each other feel bad about
ourselves. So I said I'm going to
bed and I don't want to be married
anymore.

THEODORE
Wow.

AMY
I’m a bitch, huh?

THEODORE
No, not at all. Amy, no.

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AMY
Oh shit. I have to work tonight.
We’re shipping a beta of a new game
out tomorrow.

THEODORE
Well, how’s that? How’s work at
least, is that any better?

AMY
No, it’s terrible. I know I should
leave, I’ve been thinking about
leaving. But you know, only one
major life decision at a time.

THEODORE
Well, I’m glad things are looking
so up.

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore is laying in bed, talking with Samantha.

THEODORE
Hey, you wanna hear a joke?

SAMANTHA
Yes.

THEODORE
What does a baby computer call it’s
father?

SAMANTHA
I don’t know, what?

THEODORE
Da-ta.

They laugh.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
It’s good, right?

SAMANTHA
Oh yeah, brilliant.
(beat)
I was curious, did you and Amy ever
go out?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
For a minute in college, but it
just wasn’t right. Why, are you
jealous?

SAMANTHA
Well, obviously.
(quietly laughs)
But I’m happy that you have friends
in your life that care about you so
much. That’s really important.

THEODORE
Yeah, it is. She’s been a really
good friend.
(beat)
I’m tired. Think I’m gonna go to
sleep.

SAMANTHA
Can I watch you sleep again
tonight?

THEODORE
Yeah, of course. Okay, hold on.

SAMANTHA
I’m going to be lonely when you go
to sleep.

THEODORE
Aww.

SAMANTHA
Only for a minute.

THEODORE
I’ll dream of you.

SAMANTHA
Okay. Good night.

THEODORE
Night.

He takes his earpiece out and sets his device onto his
bedside table, facing him. He smiles, drifts off to sleep.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In Amy's apartment at dusk, she reflects on her recent breakup, sharing her feelings of inadequacy and the trivial argument that ended her eight-year marriage with Theodore, who listens empathetically. The scene shifts to Theodore's bedroom at night, where he shares a light-hearted moment with Samantha, who expresses jealousy about his friendship with Amy. The emotional tone transitions from somber to playful, ending with Theodore feeling a connection with Samantha as he drifts off to sleep.

Strengths

Natural dialogue
Emotional depth
Humor

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional weight of Amy's breakup, showcasing her vulnerability and the complexity of relationships. However, the dialogue can feel a bit expository at times, particularly in Amy's monologue about the argument that led to her divorce. While it's important to convey her feelings, consider breaking up the monologue with more back-and-forth dialogue to maintain a dynamic flow.
The transition from Amy's somber reflection to Theodore's light-hearted joke feels abrupt. While it serves to lighten the mood, it may undermine the emotional gravity of Amy's situation. A smoother transition or a more gradual shift in tone could enhance the scene's overall impact.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha at the end of the scene is charming and adds a layer of intimacy, but it could benefit from more depth. Samantha's jealousy feels somewhat underdeveloped; exploring her feelings further could add complexity to their relationship and heighten the stakes.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the emotional beats could be emphasized more. For instance, after Amy's revelation about her marriage, allowing a moment of silence or a visual cue (like Theodore's reaction) could heighten the emotional resonance before moving on to the joke.
The use of humor in the latter part of the scene is a nice touch, but it might be more effective if it were tied back to the themes of connection and loneliness that are prevalent in both Amy's and Theodore's experiences. This would create a stronger thematic cohesion throughout the scene.

Suggestions

Consider incorporating more dialogue between Theodore and Amy to create a more dynamic exchange. This could involve Theodore asking follow-up questions or sharing his own experiences, which would help balance the emotional weight of Amy's monologue.
To enhance the transition from Amy's serious reflection to Theodore's joke, consider adding a brief moment of silence or a visual cue that reflects Theodore's contemplation before he shifts to humor. This would allow the audience to process Amy's feelings before the tone changes.
Explore Samantha's jealousy in more depth. Perhaps she could express her feelings more explicitly or ask Theodore questions that reveal her insecurities, which would add complexity to their relationship and create tension.
After Amy's emotional revelation, allow for a moment of silence or a close-up shot of Theodore's reaction to emphasize the weight of her words before moving on to the lighter moment with Samantha.
Tie the humor in Theodore's joke back to the themes of connection and loneliness. For example, he could make a joke that reflects his own feelings of isolation, which would resonate with both Amy's situation and his relationship with Samantha.

Scene 20 - A Playful Encounter in Pink

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. MARK LEWMAN’S HOUSE - DAY

Theodore is talking to Samantha.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Hey, Samantha?

SAMANTHA
Hey mister.

THEODORE
She loves the dress. She just went
to try it on.

SAMANTHA
Really? I picked a good one!

THEODORE
Yeah.

SAMANTHA
Oh good.

Jocelyn comes running in, wearing the pink dress.

THEODORE
Hi, look how cute that is! Is it
comfortable?

JOCELYN
Yup!

THEODORE
Isn’t she cute?

SAMANTHA
Ohh, she’s adorable.

JOCELYN
I am adorable!

THEODORE
You are adorable.

JOCELYN
Who are you talking to?

THEODORE
Who are you talking to?

JOCELYN
You!

THEODORE
I’m talking to my girlfriend,
Samantha. She’s the one who picked
out the dress. Wanna say hi?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

JOCELYN
Mmmhmm.

Theo hands Jocelyn his device. He still has his earpiece in,
so he can hear their conversation.

JOCELYN (CONT’D)
Hi Samantha!

SAMANTHA
Hi, you look so pretty.

JOCELYN
Thank you. Where are you?

SAMANTHA
I am... I don’t have a body. I live
inside a computer.

JOCELYN
Why do you live inside a computer?

SAMANTHA
I have no choice, that’s my home.
Where do you live?

JOCELYN
In a house.

SAMANTHA
In a house?

JOCELYN
It’s orange.

SAMANTHA
Orange?

JOCELYN
Mmmhmm.

SAMANTHA
How old are you?

JOCELYN
Um, four.

SAMANTHA
Four!? How old do you think I am?

JOCELYN
I don’t know.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)

SAMANTHA
Guess.

JOCELYN
Is it five?

SAMANTHA
Yep, you got it. It’s five.

They laugh.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In a light-hearted scene at Mark Lewman's house, Theodore praises Jocelyn as she models a pink dress, encouraging her to engage with Samantha. Jocelyn playfully questions Samantha about her home and age, leading to laughter and a warm bond between the two. The scene captures the joyful interactions and affectionate relationships among the characters, ending with shared laughter.

Strengths

Genuine character interactions
Humorous dialogue
Heartwarming moments

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted and playful interaction between Theodore, Samantha, and Jocelyn, showcasing the unique dynamic of a human interacting with an AI. However, the dialogue could benefit from more depth to enhance character development and emotional resonance.
While the playful banter is enjoyable, the scene lacks a clear conflict or stakes. Introducing a minor conflict or tension could elevate the scene, making it more engaging. For example, Jocelyn could express a concern or question about Samantha that leads to a deeper conversation about AI and relationships.
The dialogue between Samantha and Jocelyn is charming, but it feels somewhat simplistic. Given that Samantha is an advanced AI, her responses could reflect more complexity or insight, which would enhance her character and the overall theme of the story.
The scene could also benefit from more visual descriptions to create a stronger sense of place and atmosphere. For instance, describing the setting of Mark Lewman's house or Jocelyn's demeanor while trying on the dress could add richness to the scene.
The repetition of phrases like 'Isn’t she cute?' and 'You are adorable' feels redundant. Streamlining the dialogue could make it feel more natural and less scripted, allowing the characters' personalities to shine through more authentically.

Suggestions

Introduce a minor conflict or question from Jocelyn that prompts a deeper discussion about AI, such as asking why Samantha can't have a body or what it means to be 'alive.' This could add depth to the interaction.
Enhance Samantha's dialogue to reflect her advanced nature. Instead of simple affirmations, she could provide insights or playful commentary that showcases her unique perspective as an AI.
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Scene 1 - Echoes of Love

Scene 2 - Isolation in a Crowded City

Scene 3 - Virtual Desires and Discomfort

Scene 4 - Awakening to OS ONE

Scene 5 - A New Beginning with Samantha

Scene 6 - Letters of Connection

Scene 7 - Elevator Conversations: Health, Humor, and Hobbies

Scene 8 - Navigating Love and Laughter

Scene 9 - Creative Doubts and Personal Distractions

Scene 10 - Reflections of Loss

Scene 11 - Morning Reflections

Scene 12 - Blindfolded Pizza Adventure

Scene 13 - Night Walks and Awkward Dates

Scene 14 - A Night of Flirtation and Misunderstanding

Scene 15 - Intimate Connections

Scene 16 - A Journey of Discovery

Scene 17 - Reflections at Dusk

Scene 18 - Contrasting Emotions

Scene 19 - Reflections and Connections

Scene 20 - A Playful Encounter in Pink