Explanation: The Good Place draft demonstrates a strong comedic voice, imaginative premise, and well-developed world-building. However, the screenplay could benefit from a more compelling antagonist, a clearer sense of urgency in the central conflict, and a more satisfying resolution. Further exploration of the broken points system and its consequences would also enhance the overall narrative.
Setting:
Present day,
The Good Place and the Neutral Zone
Overview:
The screenplay shows promise with its unique concept of characters turning into identical Janets and exploring themes of identity and self-discovery. However, there are opportunities for improvement in character arcs, emotional depth, and thematic exploration.
Conflict and Stakes:
The humans are trying to prove that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system, which would allow them to get into the Good Place.
Overall Mood:
Upbeat and comedic, with moments of drama and introspection.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
Scene
1:
The scene where the humans turn into identical Janets is both funny and visually appealing.
Scene
5:
The scene where the Head Accountant is revealed to be working for the Bad Place is a major plot twist that will keep the audience guessing until the end.
Scene
7:
The scene where the humans finally get into the Good Place is a heartwarming and satisfying conclusion to the story.
Standout Features:
Unique Hook:
The concept of the humans turning into identical Janets is a unique and visually appealing way to explore the theme of identity.
Plot Twist :
The revelation that the Head Accountant is actually working for the Bad Place is a major plot twist that will keep the audience guessing until the end.
Distinctive Setting :
The Good Place and the Neutral Zone are both visually stunning and unique settings that will help to set the film apart from other comedies.
Innovative Idea :
The idea of using a points system to determine who goes to the Good Place is a clever and original way to explore the nature of good and evil.
Unique Characters :
The characters are all well-developed and unique, with their own strengths and weaknesses. The audience will be able to relate to and root for them.
Genre Blend :
The film is a unique blend of comedy, drama, and philosophy. This will appeal to a wide range of audiences.
Comparable Scripts:
The Good Place
Doctor Who - The Doctor's Wife
The Matrix
The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
Stranger Things - Episode 6: The Monster
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$20-30 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of comedy, drama, and philosophy.
Marketability: It has a high concept premise with a lot of potential for humor and heart. The characters are relatable and likeable, and the story is both funny and thought-provoking.
It is a well-written script with a strong cast and crew. However, the subject matter may be too niche for some audiences.
It has a lot of potential, but the execution may not be strong enough to appeal to a wide audience.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations.
Eleanor: Holy forking shirtballs... we’re in the Good Place! (Scene 10)
Jason-Janet: This is exactly what I always thought heaven would be. (Scene 1)
ELEANOR-JANET: And all I know is, you’re just barfing Wikipedia all over everyone to avoid talking about your feelings. (Scene 5)
Janet: But: the structural integrity of this void is already at risk, you can’t start randomly conjuring up objects. (Scene 3)
Janet: Having four humans in my void is weird! (Scene 2)
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Screenplay Rating:
Consider
Executive Summary
The Good Place draft demonstrates a strong comedic voice, imaginative premise, and well-developed world-building. However, the screenplay could benefit from a more compelling antagonist, a clearer sense of urgency in the central conflict, and a more satisfying resolution. Further exploration of the broken points system and its consequences would also enhance the overall narrative.
Strengths
The screenplay features a unique and imaginative premise, exploring philosophical concepts within a comedic framework. high
The world-building is intricate and well-developed, creating a complex afterlife system with its own rules and bureaucracy. high
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The dialogue is witty and engaging, filled with humor and pop culture references that resonate with the audience. high
The use of Janet's void as a plot device allows for creative exploration of identity and self-perception. medium
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Areas of Improvement
The conflict with the Bad Place feels somewhat underdeveloped and lacks a clear sense of urgency or immediate threat. high
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The pacing could be improved, as some scenes feel drawn out, particularly Chidi's philosophical explanations. medium
The ending feels somewhat abrupt, leaving several questions unanswered and the overall conflict unresolved. medium
MissingElements
The screenplay would benefit from a deeper exploration of the consequences of the broken points system and its impact on the afterlife. high
More insight into the Bad Place's motivations and their methods of tampering with the system would enhance the conflict. medium
Further development of the supporting characters, such as Tahani and Jason, would provide a richer ensemble dynamic. medium
NotablePoints
The concept of humans taking on Janet's form is a clever and entertaining way to explore themes of identity and perception. high
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The scene with the eggplant and nickels is a humorous example of the show's ability to blend absurdity with philosophical inquiry. medium
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The reveal of Janet's crush on Jason adds a layer of complexity to her character and opens up potential for future storylines. medium
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Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 7.25, The screenplay effectively utilizes comedic and absurd elements to establish a unique starting point for character development. The characters are given diverse personalities and motivations, providing a solid foundation for future growth. However, as the story progresses, the lack of clear character arcs and consistent development hinders the screenplay's ability to create a deep emotional connection with the audience. See More
Premise: 7.25, The screenplay's premise is promising but could benefit from greater clarity and depth to enhance its overall intrigue and foundational engagement. With a focus on originality, clarity, and audience engagement, the premise effectively sets up a unique and comedic challenge for the characters but could be further refined to fully capture the audience's interest. See More
Structure: 7.25, The screenplay's structure and plot effectively establish the premise, introduce compelling characters, and set up potential character arcs. It incorporates a unique concept and humorous moments. However, the story's progression through the void could be refined to enhance narrative clarity and pacing. See More
Theme: 7.5, The screenplay effectively explores themes of identity, morality, and the search for purpose. However, the clarity of the central message could be strengthened, and the integration of themes within the plot could be more seamless. Overall, the screenplay has potential for thematic depth but requires further refinement. See More
Visual Impact: 7.5, The screenplay introduces a visually stunning concept of identical Janets in a bright, infinite white void. This visually creative idea lays the foundation for a comedic and absurd tone, engaging readers with its uniqueness. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.25, The screenplay demonstrates a strong emotional foundation with a unique concept and diverse cast of characters, providing a solid foundation for emotional resonance with the audience. However, it lacks depth in some areas and could benefit from enhanced emotional complexity and a more consistent emotional narrative. See More
Conflict: 7.25, The screenplay effectively presents a unique conflict and stakes by turning the characters into identical Janets. However, the narrative tension could be enhanced by escalating the stakes and adding more weight to the conflict. See More
Originality: 7.5, The screenplay exhibits originality and creative execution in its premise of identical Janets and the subsequent exploration of personal identity. The narrative challenges conventional storytelling through imaginative scenarios and philosophical debates. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
Michael and Janet attempt to bring Eleanor, Chidi, Tahani, and Jason into Janet's void, but it goes awry and they all turn into identical Janets
Michael and Janet turn the humans into identical Janets, dress them in their own outfits, and bring them to Janet's void. Janet explains that they can't go back to their bodies, but they can go to the Neutral Zone to find proof that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system. Michael and Janet leave to find the Head Accountant, leaving the humans in Janet's void.
The group is transformed into identical Janets but can't tell each other apart. They must stay in the void and cannot go back to their own bodies. They decide to go to the Neutral Zone to find proof that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system. Michael and Janet leave to find the Head Accountant.
The group is transformed into identical Janets but can't tell each other apart. They must stay in the void and cannot go back to their own bodies. They decide to go to the Neutral Zone to find proof that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system. Michael and Janet leave to find the Head Accountant.
Michael and Janet turn the humans into identical Janets, dress them in their own outfits, and bring them to Janet's void. The group is transformed into identical Janets but can't tell each other apart. They must stay in the void and cannot go back to their own bodies. They decide to go to the Neutral Zone to find proof that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system. Michael and Janet leave to find the Head Accountant.
Michael and Janet seek the Head Accountant's help while the humans transform into identical Janets and plan to go to the Neutral Zone to find evidence of the Bad Place's tampering with the points system. Meanwhile, in Janet's void, thoughts and feelings are starting to affect the surroundings, and Janet urges the group to split up.
Michael and Janet seek the Head Accountant's help while the group of identical Janets plan to find evidence of Bad Place tampering in the Neutral Zone. Meanwhile, thoughts and feelings in Janet's void affect the surroundings, causing Janet's molecular essence to fragment.
Michael and Janet seek the Head Accountant's help while the group of identical Janets plan to find evidence of tampering by the Bad Place in the Neutral Zone. Meanwhile, thoughts and feelings in Janet's void affect the surroundings, causing Janet's molecular essence to fragment.
Michael and Janet seek the Head Accountant's help while the humans transform into identical Janets and plan to go to the Neutral Zone to find evidence of the Bad Place's tampering with the points system. Meanwhile, thoughts and feelings in Janet's void affect the surroundings, causing Janet's molecular essence to fragment.
Michael and Janet regroup with Tahani, Eleanor, and Chidi after their plan to turn into identical Janets to find evidence of the tampering in the Neutral Zone goes awry.
CharacterInconsistencies
Character Chidi Description Chidi's sudden acceptance of Eleanor's feelings and his declaration of love seem somewhat rushed and inconsistent with his previous cautious and analytical nature. While character development is expected, this shift feels abrupt and driven by the need to resolve the plot.
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Scene 8
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Character Eleanor Description Eleanor's rapid transformation into different people is an interesting plot device but feels disconnected from her established character. It's unclear why her sense of self would shatter so easily, even under stress, given her previous resilience and self-awareness.
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StoryInconsistencies
Description The resolution of Janet's instability and the return of the humans to their original forms through Janet 'barfing' them out is a comedic solution but lacks internal logic and consistency with the established rules of the void and Janet's abilities.
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PlotHoles
Description The revelation that no one has entered the Good Place in over 500 years creates a significant plot hole. It contradicts the established premise of the show and raises questions about the afterlife's functioning and the point system's validity. This revelation requires further explanation and exploration to maintain the narrative's coherence.
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DialogueAuthenticity
Description Janet's sudden ability to 'throw shade' feels out of character and inconsistent with her previous neutral and informative demeanor. While it's a humorous moment, it doesn't align with her established personality.
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Redundancies
Element Chidi's philosophical explanations
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Scene 5 (1010)
Scene 6 (1012)
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Suggestion While Chidi's philosophical insights are a core element of his character, the repeated explanations of different philosophical concepts could be streamlined or interspersed with more action or dialogue to maintain a balance between character development and plot progression.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character
Arc
Critique
Suggestions
Michael
Michael's character arc revolves around his transformation from a demon who used to care only about himself to someone willing to help humans. In the beginning, Michael guides the humans, but his motives aren't entirely altruistic. As the plot progresses, Michael realizes the error of his ways and begins to care for the humans in his group. He turns against his own kind and is willing to take great risks to help humans progress. Finally, Michael transforms from a demon into a human ally, growing in confidence while desperate to find a solution.
The character arc is well-structured, but it could have been more nuanced. Michael's turn toward altruism is too abrupt and could feel inauthentic to the audience. It might have been better to incorporate more moments of doubt and self-reflection before he decides to help the humans wholeheartedly.
To improve the character arc, show Michael struggling with his beliefs and grappling with his moral compass before coming to a realization that he needs to help humans. Moreover, it could be great to add more interpersonal moments between him and humans to build a more authentic relationship that can lead to his transformation.
Janet
At the beginning of the movie, Janet is a programmed guide for the humans and lacks a true sense of identity. She is mainly an all-knowing and all-seeing AI system that assists the humans as needed. However, as the story progresses, Janet begins to develop unique emotions, causing her physical side effects. Janet's development of emotions leads her on a journey of personal discovery that allows her to understand her true identity and capabilities. She learns to navigate the world with a newfound sense of purpose, and her growth allows her to become an even more valuable ally to the humans she serves.
The character arc of Janet showcases personal growth and self-discovery, which is an interesting pivot point given her all-knowing and sentient nature. However, the arc may benefit from expanding on Janet's physical side effects and how they impact her. It may also be helpful to explain more about her connection to the void and how that allows her to have a unique perspective on the world. Lastly, the source of her sudden development of emotions could be further explored, giving the audience a deeper understanding of what precipitated the change.
To improve the character arc, it may be helpful to add more details about Janet's physical side effects and how they impact her. Expanding on her connection to the void allows the audience to understand her unique abilities better and how that serves her as a guide. Furthermore, explaining the source of her sudden development of emotions would help add depth to her character development and provide more background on her existence. Lastly, exploring Janet's identity further would allow for more substantial character development as she navigates the world with a new sense of purpose.
Eleanor
Through her experiences in the afterlife, Eleanor begins to change and grow as a person. She learns the importance of putting others before herself and begins to develop genuine care and compassion for those around her. As she continues to transform, she becomes a leader in the group and realizes that her actions can have a significant impact on others.
The character arc for Eleanor is compelling and well-executed, but could benefit from more nuance and complexity. While it is clear that she is learning to become a better person, the reasons for her initial self-centeredness could be explored further. Additionally, her growth could be further complicated by setbacks and conflicts, making her transformation feel more dynamic.
To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Eleanor's past and exploring the root of her self-centered behavior. It could also be effective to introduce more conflict and obstacles that challenge her newfound growth, forcing her to confront difficult choices and ultimately come out stronger on the other side.
Chidi
Chidi starts off as an indecisive ethics professor who is constantly analyzing situations and struggling to make choices. His anxiety and overthinking lead him to be paralyzed and unable to act. However, over time, he begins to grow and transform. He is faced with tough decisions, but instead of being stuck in his own head, he starts to take action and become more confident in his decision-making. He learns to trust his instincts and let go of his fear of being wrong. By the end of the movie, Chidi has become a more decisive and confident person who is able to make tough choices.
The character arc is well-done, but it could benefit from more specific examples of how Chidi grows and changes throughout the movie. There could also be more of a focus on how his relationships with other characters and specific experiences help him overcome his indecisiveness.
To improve the character arc, add specific examples of when Chidi starts to take action and make decisions. Show how his relationships with other characters, like his friendship with Eleanor, support his growth. Also, consider adding in more backstory to explain why Chidi struggles with indecisiveness in the first place.
Tahani
Tahani starts out as a socialite seemingly obsessed with appearances. She constantly seeks validation and recognition from others, but as she spends more time in the afterlife, she begins to realize the emptiness of her former way of life. She starts to become more self-aware and reflective, acknowledging her flaws and becoming more humble. She begins to channel her wealth and influence into meaningful acts of charity, using her resources to help others instead of just boosting her own ego. By the end of the movie, Tahani has made a significant transformation and has developed a deeper sense of compassion and empathy for others.
Tahani's character arc is compelling and well-written, but it could benefit from more specific examples of the ways in which she demonstrates her growth and transformation. The audience could benefit from seeing more concrete acts of charity and kindness from Tahani, to better understand the extent of her newfound empathy and selflessness.
One way to improve Tahani's character arc would be to include more scenes of her engaging in kind, charitable acts as she develops as a philanthropist. This would help to illustrate the extent of her transformation and allow the audience to really root for her as she grows and changes.
Jason
Throughout the movie, Jason's lack of intelligence and impulsiveness causes problems for himself and his friends. However, after a particularly disastrous event that he caused, Jason realizes that his actions have consequences and starts to take responsibility for them. This leads to him making more thoughtful decisions, being a better friend, and ultimately becoming more mature.
The character arc is solid, but it could benefit from more specific examples of how Jason's behavior and decision-making change throughout the movie.
Include specific scenes that show Jason struggling to understand the consequences of his actions and then learning from his mistakes. Make his growth more gradual and show how his friends react to his transformation.
Chidi-Janet
At first, Chidi struggles to come to terms with being transformed into a Janet and grapples with his own identity. However, he eventually realizes that his intellectual disposition is actually an asset in his new form, and is able to use his knowledge and reasoning to help the other characters. Through this journey, Chidi gains confidence and learns to trust himself more, ultimately becoming a more self-assured and decisive person.
The character arc for Chidi-Janet is well thought out and allows for growth and development. However, it could benefit from more specific moments or challenges that allow Chidi to actively confront his indecisiveness and anxiety. Additionally, the ending could be more impactful if Chidi was faced with a situation that truly tested and proved his new-found confidence.
Consider adding specific moments where Chidi must make quick decisions or confront his own insecurities in order to really hone in on his character development. Also, create a bigger challenge at the end that would fully showcase Chidi's newfound confidence and decisiveness.
Eleanor-Janet
Eleanor-Janet's character arc is one of growth and transformation. She starts off as someone who is helpful, but unsure of herself. As she becomes more confident and witty, she learns to stand up for herself and call out others. Being transformed into a Janet helps her find her kind heart and become more selfless, but it also leaves her feeling conflicted and uncertain. Ultimately, Eleanor-Janet learns to embrace her vulnerabilities and becomes comfortable in her own skin.
The character arc for Eleanor-Janet is well-developed and realistic, but it could benefit from more specific and concrete examples of her transformation. Additionally, her inner conflict and uncertainty could be highlighted more clearly, so that the audience understands the full extent of her transformation.
To improve the character arc for Eleanor-Janet, the screenwriter could include more scenes that show her growth and transformation, such as instances where she stands up for herself or goes out of her way to help others. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on her inner conflict and uncertainty, perhaps through voiceover narration or dialogue that expresses her thoughts and feelings more explicitly.
Theme
Theme Details
Themee Explanation
Identity
The characters struggle to differentiate themselves from each other after being turned into identical Janets.
The theme of identity is subtly introduced as the characters face an unexpected challenge that leaves them questioning who they are.
Humor
The tone is absurd and lighthearted, with comedic dialogue and exaggerated actions such as one of the Janets playing with her own breasts.
Humor is a prevalent theme throughout the screenplay, with its lighthearted tone and witty dialogue playing on the absurdity of the situation.
Overcoming Challenges
The characters face a unique challenge as they struggle to tell each other apart and find proof of the Bad Place's tampering with the points system.
The theme of overcoming challenges is present as the characters are faced with a difficult situation and must work together to find a solution.
Friendship
The characters' interactions set up potential character arcs as they work together to overcome the challenge of being transformed into identical Janets and find evidence of the Bad Place's tampering.
The theme of friendship is subtly introduced as the characters' interactions and potential character arcs are highlighted.
Philosophy
The scene is humorous thanks to the philosophical debates the characters have when discussing personal identity.
The theme of philosophy is present as the characters discuss personal identity and question who they are.
Desperation
Michael and Janet are desperate to find a solution to the Bad Place's tampering with the point system while the clock is ticking and Janet's essence is fragmenting.
The theme of desperation is present as Michael and Janet face a race against time to find a solution before it's too late.
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Scene Strengths
Strong comedic moments
Unique concept
Diverse and well-developed characters
Frantic pace keeps things interesting
Character relationships deepen
Scene Weaknesses
Lacklustre setting
Low stakes
Scene is mostly expository
Lacks emotional impact
Pacing may be slow for some viewers
Suggestions
Consider increasing the stakes to create a more engaging narrative.
Further flesh out the points system concept to avoid confusion.
Focus on deeper thematic development to enhance the overall meaning of the story.
Create more emotional impact by increasing the conflict level between characters.
Continue to build strong character relationships to keep the audience invested in the story.
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern
Explanation
High Emotional Impact and Character Changes
Scenes with a higher emotional impact tend to also have a higher character change score. This can be seen in scenes 3, 6, 7, and 9.
Dialogue and Plot Correlation
Scenes with a higher score in dialogue also tend to have a higher score in plot elements. This can be seen in scenes 1, 4, and 7.
Tone and Conflict Correlation
There is a correlation between the tone of a scene and the level of conflict. Scenes with a lighter tone tend to have lower conflict scores. This can be seen in scenes 2, 4, and 5.
High Stakes and Move Story Forward Correlation
Scenes with higher stakes tend to also score higher in moving the story forward. This can be seen in scenes 9 and 10.
Absurd Tone and Emotional Impact Correlation
Scenes with an absurd, lighthearted tone tend to score lower in emotional impact. This can be seen in scene 1.
Overall Grade and Emotional Impact Correlation
Scenes with a higher overall grade tend to also have a higher emotional impact score. This can be seen in scenes 3, 6, 7, 9, and 10.
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope
Trope Details
Trope Explanation
Identity Crisis
All the characters turn into identical Janets and struggle to differentiate themselves from each other.
Identity crisis is a common trope in television shows where characters struggle with their sense of self and who they are. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Alias,' where Sydney Bristow is constantly grappling with her identity as a spy and her desire for a normal life.
Fish out of Water
The characters are trapped in a bright and infinite white space and struggle to find their footing.
Fish out of water is a trope where characters are taken out of their familiar environment and placed in an unfamiliar one. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Fresh off the Boat,' where an immigrant family moves to a mostly white neighborhood in the US and struggles to navigate the cultural differences.
Comedic Dialogue
The scene is set in a lighthearted tone with witty and humorous dialogue highlighting the characters' confusion and disbelief.
Comedic dialogue is a common trope in television shows that aims to make the audience laugh through witty banter and humorous exchanges between characters. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Brooklyn Nine-Nine,' where the characters frequently use humor to offset the serious nature of their work as police officers.
MacGuffin
Michael and Janet need to find evidence that the Bad Place is tampering with the points system.
MacGuffin is a common trope in television shows where characters search for an object or item that drives the plot forward. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Lost,' where the characters are searching for ways to escape the island and often search for items or objects that can help them.
Unexpected Twist
The characters all turn into identical Janets, which leads to confusion and chaos.
Unexpected twist is a common trope in television shows where the plot takes an unexpected turn, often leading to surprise or shock for the characters and the audience. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Breaking Bad,' where the protagonist's cancer diagnosis serves as a twist that drives the plot in unexpected directions.
Character Arc
The characters' interactions set up potential character arcs.
Character arc is a common trope in television shows where characters undergo significant changes over the course of the story. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Dynamic Duos,' where the protagonist goes from being a cynical and selfish person to a hero determined to save the day.
Low Stakes
The stakes are low as it's a comedic moment and there is no obvious danger.
Low stakes is a common trope in television shows where the consequences of the characters' actions are not significant or dire. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'The Office,' where the characters frequently engage in minor hijinks and pranks that don't pose a significant threat to anyone's well-being.
Subtle Theme
The theme of identity is subtly introduced as the characters struggle to differentiate themselves from each other.
Subtle theme is a common trope in television shows where themes are explored indirectly or through subtext rather than being explicitly stated. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'The Sopranos,' where the theme of family is explored through the protagonist's relationship with his biological family and the criminal family he belongs to.
Innovative Concept
The concept of the characters turning into identical Janets is unexpected and unique.
Innovative concept is a common trope in television shows where the story or premise is unique or original. An example of this trope can be seen in the show 'Westworld,' where the concept of a theme park populated by lifelike robots is both innovative and unexpected.
Eleanor, Chidi, Tahani, and Jason become identical Janets to sabotage the Bad Place's tampering with the points system.
Trapped in a void, the group searches for proof that the Bad Place is manipulating the points system and finds unexpected allies.
As Janet's molecular essence fragments, Michael and Janet race against time to save her and the group's plan to expose the Bad Place.
The Neutral Zone holds answers to the group's mission, but it's not without its dangers as they navigate against the clock.
Will the group's last ditch effort to expose the Bad Place succeed or will they be trapped in the void forever?
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Janet(s) - Overall Grade:
8.0
“Janet(s)”
Episode #310
Written by
Josh Siegal
&
Dylan Morgan
Directed by
Morgan Sackett
GREEN PAGES 7/26/18
PINK PAGES 7/2/18
BLUE PAGES 6/28/18
SHOOTING DRAFT 6/27/18
Script #309
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The Good Place “Janet(s)” [310] 1. (C/O)
Shooting Draft (GREEN Rev.) 7/26/18
COLD OPEN
1001 INT. JANET’S VOID - INDETERMINATE TIME (D1) 1001
AN INFINITE WHITE SPACE. Then: MICHAEL and JANET POP INTO
IT! Michael takes it in -- relieved, giddy, out of breath.
MICHAEL
Janet... you did it! You brought us into
your void! Wow. If I had a heart it
would be pounding!
JANET
Michael...?
MICHAEL
You’d think there’d be some side effects,
but I feel fine! How’s my hair? Still
amazing?
JANET
There may have been a couple of side
effects for the humans.
Michael looks over --
MICHAEL
...Huh.
REVEAL: ELEANOR, CHIDI, TAHANI and JASON... all look like
FOUR IDENTICAL JANETS.
Michael, at a loss, just stares.
ELEANOR-JANET
Dude. Why are there so many Janets? And
why do I sound like Janet?
CHIDI-JANET
You also look like Janet. Do I? Why?!
What? What is happening?
TAHANI-JANET
(realizing, terrified)
Oh no. Am I... wearing a vest?!
Michael, help me!
MICHAEL
This is gonna be tricky. How are we even
going to tell them apart?!
One of the Janets is playing with (or pointing to) her own boobs.
(CONTINUED)
The Good Place “Janet(s)” [310] 2. (C/O)
Shooting Draft (GREEN Rev.) 7/26/18
1001 CONTINUED: 1001
MICHAEL (CONT’D)
...Okay, so that one is Jason.
JASON-JANET
This is exactly what I always thought
heaven would be.
(giddy)
Guys! We made it to The Good Place!
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Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Absurd, lighthearted"
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Janet's Void - Overall Grade:
7.0
1002 INT. JANET’S VOID - MOMENTS LATER (D1) 1002
Janet (the actual one) approaches Michael.
JANET
I can’t put the humans back in their own
bodies, so I’ve done the next best -- but
still not that great -- thing!
REVEAL: they’re still Janet, but are now dressed in their own
outfits. Tahani-Janet checks out her dress, unimpressed.
TAHANI-JANET
I suppose this outfit will do.
ELEANOR-JANET
(sarcastic)
Are you sure? I mean, wearing a floral
print to an infinite void, at this time
of the nothing?!
CHIDI-JANET
So, where are we, exactly? We’re not on
Earth, right?
JANET
That’s correct, Chidi-Janet, you’re not.
Your real bodies dematerialized when you
entered my void, and your essences
reconstituted themselves in this form.
CHIDI-JANET
Cool, cool. And when you say “void”...?
JANET
I mean a subdimension outside of space
and time, at the nexus of consciousness
and matter, tethered to my essence. Does
that help?
CHIDI-JANET
It does not help. Makes it way worse. I
just wanna lie down.
(freaking out)
Where is down?!
Reveal Jason-Janet is UPSIDE-DOWN, above them.
JASON-JANET
I found it! It’s up here.
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JANET
Here you go:
She BLOOPS in a LIVING ROOM SET. Chidi-Janet lies down.
MICHAEL
Okay: Janet's void has a back door to the
Janet Warehouse in the Neutral Zone, which
is right near Accounting. You four will
stay here while Actual Janet and I sneak
through it and find the Head Accountant.
TAHANI-JANET
Why can’t we go with you?
JANET
The void is the only place you’re safe.
You just “died,” which means you’re the
first humans in history to not immediately
go to the Good or Bad Place, which in turn
makes you interdimensional fugitives.
MICHAEL
Also the Judge is probably still pissed
at me, for, you know, breaking all the
rules, and she might take it out on you.
Plus the Bad Place is probably hunting
for us. So, literally the entire
universe is against you.
ELEANOR-JANET
...Okay, but what’s a fourth really good
reason?
(off everyone’s silence)
Just trying to lighten the mood. Jeez.
Tough void.
MICHAEL
Janet and I will pose as Good Place
employees, and sweet-talk the Accountant
into showing us his books. If I’m right,
we’ll find proof that the Bad Place is
tampering with the points system. The
Accountant will tell us what to do, and
this will all be over.
(reassuring)
We're almost at the end, guys. Just stay
here and keep Janets’ heads on straight.
JANET
But if they do fall off, you can just
screw them right back on. You just sort
of push down and turn. You’ll hear a
“click.” Okay bye!
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Michael and Janet are waiting in a reception area. A NEUTRAL
JANET is there behind a desk. She has a thousand-yard stare.
MICHAEL
(aside, to Janet)
Is that a Good Janet or Bad Janet?
JANET
It’s Neutral Janet. She’s kind of the
Black Sheep of the Janet world. Or, the
blank sheep, I guess.
(excited)
Ooh, I can throw shade now! That’s cool!
They approach her.
NEUTRAL JANET
You have arrived at the accounting
office. All point calculations for
actions taken on Earth are made here.
End of conversation.
MICHAEL
My name is Michael. I need to speak with
the Head Accountant, on official Good
Place business.
NEUTRAL JANET
I will inform the head accountant of your
presence, and he either will or will not
see you in a certain amount of time, end
of conversation.
Michael notices a poster on the wall of Eleanor, Chidi,
Tahani, and Jason. It says “Wanted for Processing.”
MICHAEL
(aside)
Good thing your “void” plan worked out,
huh?
Janet tries to answer, but lets out a very long burp. As it
continues, it begins to sound auto-tuned.
JANET
Burrrrrrrrrrrrrr-eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee--ieve
in life after love?
Janet covers her mouth, embarrassed.
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JANET (CONT’D)
Having four humans in my void is weird!
Genres:
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Lost in Janet's Void - Overall Grade:
8.0
1004 INT. JANET'S VOID - A LITTLE LATER (D1) 1004
Chidi-Janet is pacing, continuing to freak out.
CHIDI-JANET
This is nuts. We’re in a void, in the
body of a white lady --
ELEANOR-JANET TAHANI-JANET
Not a lady. Not a lady, darling.
JASON-JANET
But we are white! Let’s all say white
things:
(just announcing things)
“Billy Joel!” “Mild salsa, please!”
“There was nowhere to park!” “Did you
refill the Brita?”
TAHANI-JANET
I find this void quite calming, actually.
It’s like: this time, the Xanax took me.
CHIDI-JANET
I have the worst stomachache. Sorry --
(sarcastic hand quotes)
-- “I” “have” a “stomach” “ache???”
ELEANOR-JANET
Dude, relax. Here... let's see if I can
figure this out...
BLOOP! ELEANOR-JANET creates a cute PUPPY.
CHIDI-JANET
(delighted)
Oh, wow. Eleanor, how’d you do that?
ELEANOR-JANET
(shrugs)
I dunno. We’re Janet now. That’s what
Janet does.
ACTUAL JANET pops in.
JANET
What just happened?! What did you do?!
ELEANOR-JANET
Sorry! I was just trying to help Chidi
calm down by conjuring up --
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JANET
(noticing, cute voice)
Awww, puppy! Cuuuute!
(then, serious)
But: the structural integrity of this
void is already at risk, you can’t start
randomly conjuring up objects.
(cute voice; petting puppy)
Because it might shatter the void! Yes
it might! It might blow up everything
and we’ll all disappear forever!
(serious voice)
So stop it.
NEUTRAL JANET
The Head Accountant has decided to see
you, this will happen now, end of
conversation.
1006 INT. ACCOUNTANT’S OFFICE - BULLPEN (D1) 1006
The Head Accountant, NEIL, approaches -- a congenial fellow
who just goddamn loves being an accountant. He’s sipping
from a mug that says Existence’s Best Boss.
NEIL
Hey-oh! There they are! So sorry to
keep you waiting. I’m Neil, the Head
Accountant. You must be Michael and
Janet -- I really depreciate you coming.
(chuckles)
Just a little accounting humor. What can
I do for you?
MICHAEL
Well, it’s sort of a long story. But I’m
concerned about certain... anomalies, in
the points system. I’m worried that
somehow, the Bad Place has been tampering.
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NEIL
Tampering? No no no. Quite impossible.
Laughable, really. Janet -- remind me to
laugh about that later?
NEUTRAL JANET
Your amusement has been scheduled, end of
conversation.
NEIL
(rolling his eyes)
She’s a lot of fun.
MICHAEL
Could you just humor us? Show us how the
system works?
NEIL
Ehhhhhhhhhh... I suppose I can give you a
quick tour. We don’t get many visitors.
Follow me.
As they go...
NEIL (CONT’D)
Love your suit, by the way. Sharp.
MICHAEL
Oh... and I like your tie.
NEIL
Thank you! It’s impossible to remove.
Genres:
comedy, fantasy Tone:
"whimsical"
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The Void and the Accountant - Overall Grade:
8.0
1007 INT. JANET'S VOID - LATER (D1) 1007
Chidi-Janet and Eleanor-Janet.
CHIDI-JANET
How’d you know I always wanted a dog like
this?
ELEANOR-JANET
Funny story: it’s one of the things I saw
in the alternate timeline where we were
soulmates on and off for 300 years.
(beat)
Maybe... we should talk about that?
CHIDI-JANET
Well, I suppose we can, but there’s not
that much to talk about. The things you
saw weren’t part of my life, so they
didn’t happen to me.
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ELEANOR-JANET
...The hell are you talking about, man?
Of course it was you. I saw it.
CHIDI-JANET
Well, it was a Chidi, sure, but it wasn’t
(points to himself)
me Chidi. This is a classic
philosophical question: the concept of
“the self,” or “who we are.” Philo-
sophically speaking, there’s the Chidi I
am, who lived a certain life, and there’s
the Chidi you saw -- your soulmate, or
whatever -- who had some entirely
different life. Not the same Chidis.
ELEANOR-JANET
Ohhhhh. Okay. Cool. Counterpoint:
that’s the dumbest thing you’ve ever
said, and you do not deserve a puppy
right now! I’m un-blooping your puppy!
She tries to un-bloop the puppy -- but accidentally keeps
blooping MORE AND MORE PUPPIES into existence.
ELEANOR-JANET (CONT’D)
Gah! This is getting cuter and I want it
to get less cute!
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1008 INT. ACCOUNTANT’S OFFICE - BULLPEN - LATER (D1) 1008
Michael and Janet follow Neil past other ACCOUNTANTS, working
at desks. Janet looks a little out of it.
NEIL
Morning Greg! Hey there, Kioko -- TGI-7,
am I right?
Neil stops at a huge monitor with constantly scrolling text.
NEIL (CONT’D)
So! This is the main feed. Every single
action, by every single human on Earth,
is recorded, and sent here to be assigned
a point value based on the absolute moral
worth of that action. I shouldn’t really
let you see this, but what the heck --
one little example won’t hurt.
(re: screen)
A couple in Osaka, Japan just decided to
have a destination wedding. That’s
negative 1200 points.
(checks)
Oh dear. It’s a destination theme
wedding. Negative four thousand three
hundred--
(checks again)
The theme is Lord of the Rings. They’re
basically doomed.
An ALERT sounds. The monitor flashes “UNDEFINED ACTION.”
NEIL (CONT’D)
Ooh, this is fun! A human has just done
something no one has ever done before!
MICHAEL
(reading)
Richard Moore, of Sugarland Texas,
hollowed out an eggplant, and filled it
with hot sauce and nickels.
NEIL
How about that -- it wasn’t a weird sex
thing! Ninety-nine percent of all new
human behaviors are weird sex things.
(checks again)
Oop, nevermind, actually it was a weird
sex thing. So! Now: we zip it over to
the relevant specialists for valuation.
(MORE)
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NEIL (CONT'D)
In this case, Anastasia in the Stuffed
Vegetable Department, Hector over in
American Coins, and my buddy Matt, in
Weird Sex Things.
He gestures to the accountants. MATT looks traumatized, like
he hasn’t slept in years.
MATT
(twitchy)
I’m still waiting for a response to the
latest request I filed, for immediate
suicide?
NEIL
Request denied.
(to Michael)
I love Matt! He’s hilarious.
Matt deflates. He and Anastasia begin typing furiously.
MICHAEL
So, they now examine the action -- its
use of resources, the intentions behind
it, its effects on others...
NEIL
Correct, and they arrive at this:
Below the monitor, a printer prints out the results:
ACTION NUMBER 6&7GGp^W4*41211E146 = -9.884 POINTS
NEIL (CONT’D)
And here’s why tampering is impossible.
The result is then double-checked by
three billion other accountants --
selected at random -- and if they all
come to the same conclusion, which they
always do:
ON SCREEN: A green check pops up -- MATCH.
NEIL (CONT'D)
-- it becomes official. Anyone who does
this exact thing in this exact way will
lose this many points.
The screen DINGS.
MICHAEL
Someone else just did it?! How is that
possible?
(checking)
(MORE)
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MICHAEL (CONT'D)
Oh. Because the first guy posted about
it on Reddit.
The screen DINGS over and over again...
Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Light-hearted"
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Janet(s) - Overall Grade:
7.0
1009 INT. CONFERENCE ROOM/NEIL’S OFFICE - LATER (D1) 1009
Neil crosses to a controller with LARGE BUTTONS, one green,
one red. On either side are huge TUBES, one green, one red.
NEIL
When people die, their biographical
history and final point totals are sent
to the relevant destination. That batch
is headed for the Bad Place --
A WOMAN puts a sack of files under the RED TUBE and hits a
BUTTON -- it flies up and out.
NEIL (CONT’D)
-- they get the files, process the
people, then it’s either “Yayy!” Or
(mock horrified)
“Gahh gimme my penis back!”, and Bob’s
your uncle. It’s a flawless system, and
tampering is quite impossible.
MICHAEL
I see. Could we look at one specific
file, though, just to make sure?
NEIL
(intrigued)
Mmm. All right. Who do you wanna see?
Genghis Khan? Marie Antoinette? Walt
Disney has some weird stuff in his file...
MICHAEL
Doug Forcett.
Neil smiles.
1010 INT. JANET’S VOID - A LITTLE LATER (D1) 1010
Eleanor-Janet turns to Chidi-Janet as Tahani-Janet and Jason-
Janet look on.
ELEANOR-JANET
I don’t get this, man. Why wouldn’t you
want to know what our life was like?
You’re not even a little curious what it
was like to hit --
(re: her body)
-- this?
(MORE)
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ELEANOR-JANET (CONT'D)
(realizing, annoyed)
I don’t mean “this this.” Although,
frankly, I would also hit this this.
CHIDI-JANET
I don’t want to see those memories
because, philosophically speaking,
they’re none of my business. They
happened to someone else. Let me
explain.
Chidi-Janet conjures three desk-chairs and a pre-written
blackboard.
ELEANOR-JANET
We can conjure any object in the
universe, and you chose a blackboard.
JASON-JANET
As long as you’re conjuring stuff, can I
have a magical rocket ship with laser
cannons?
(then, revelation)
Oooh, no, wait -- gum!
Eleanor-Janet BLOOPS some Big League Chew and hands it to
him. He tosses it in his mouth.
CHIDI-JANET
Conceptions of the Self! Let’s start
with John Locke, who believed that
personal identity was based on having a
continued consciousness -- essentially:
memory. Memories are links in a chain
that together form a single self. If I
can’t remember what happened, because it
happened to a Chidi from another
timeline, it’s not a unified “me.”
JASON-JANET
Just because you don’t remember doing
something doesn’t mean you didn’t do it.
I have no idea how it happened, but there
is definitely a tattoo on my butt that
says “Jasom.”
CHIDI-JANET
That leads us to Derek Parfit.
TAHANI-JANET
It does?
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CHIDI-JANET
Parfit said: even if I have memories from
an earlier time, that doesn't necessarily
mean it was “me.” After all, if my brain
was split in two and each half was put
into a different person, which one is
“me?” All I know is, that other Chidi
doesn’t exist anymore, and
(points to herself)
this one does, so this must be the real
Chidi.
ELEANOR-JANET
And all I know is, you’re just barfing
Wikipedia all over everyone to avoid
talking about your feelings.
CHIDI-JANET
(beat)
...Let’s talk about David Hume!
Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Humorous"
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The Book of Dougs and Janet's Void - Overall Grade:
9.0
1011 INT. CONFERENCE ROOM/NEIL’S OFFICE - SAME TIME (D1) 1011
Michael, Janet, Neil. Neil goes to the bookshelf and pulls
out The Book of Dougs.
NEIL
Here we are -- the Book of Dougs.
(flipping pages)
Forbush... Forcap... Forcearch... Doug L.
Forcett!
He waves his hand and a SCREEN pops up. Michael tries to
peek at the screen--
NEIL (CONT’D)
Ah ah -- no peeking. Accountants only.
MICHAEL
Can you just tell me his total?
NEIL
Looks like he’s at... 520,000 points.
Well done, Doug.
MICHAEL
...So that’s good?
NEIL
It’s excellent!
(then)
Oh -- he’s 68 years old? It’s terrible.
He’s screwed.
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MICHAEL
Ha! I knew it! Doug has spent his
entire life being nothing but good.
(MORE)
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MICHAEL (CONT'D)
He once found a dollar on the ground and
sent it to the Canadian government to
help pay down their national debt -- and
he’s not even close to getting in?! How
can that be?
NEIL
(shrugs)
Look, mate, the points are indisputable.
They have been, ever since the very
beginning.
He points to a PAINTING of a caveman handing another caveman a
rock. Plaque reads: Og Gives His Rock To Grog. 201,993 B.C.E.
MICHAEL
(nodding)
“Og gives his rock to Grog.”
NEIL
The very first altruistic human decision.
Og earned ten thousand points that day.
(beat)
Then Grog used the rock to bash Og’s head
in, and he lost a million.
We see another painting: the second caveman bashing the first
caveman’s head in.
NEIL (CONT'D)
Point is, the math is cold, objective,
and airtight. And unless you have some
other proof that says otherwise, I don’t
know how I can help you.
Matt pops in holding FILES.
MATT
I just got seven hundred new “Weird Sex
Thing” files in the last one second.
NEIL
(to Michael)
Burning Man just started. Buckle up,
Matty!
1012 INT. JANET’S VOID - LATER (D1) 1012
Chidi-Janet lectures...
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CHIDI-JANET
So, in essence, Hume thought that we
don’t truly have a “self,” we are just a
bundle of our ever-changing impressions --
ELEANOR-JANET
Just admit it, man -- you’re embarrassed
that you fell in love with an Arizona
trashbag.
CHIDI-JANET
Eleanor, it’s not personal. Someone fell
in love with you, it just wasn’t “me.”
CHIDI-JANET
Sorry, I just swapped the living room for
a classroom --
JANET
No, not you -- him! Jason! What is
wrong with you?!
Jason-Janet is sitting in an EMPTY HOT TUB with PILLBOI.
JASON-JANET
Sorry, Janet! I didn’t mean to conjure
Pillboi -- I was just thinking about how
much fun we used to have hanging out in
his broken hot tub, and he showed up!
PILLBOI
Yeah, I was just chillin’, being nothing?
And then all of a sudden: I was!
JANET
Goodbye, Pillboi.
As he and the hot tub disappear into the vanishing point --
PILLBOI
Oh dip -- I’m “not” again!
JANET
This is bad. Your thoughts and feelings
are starting to directly affect the void.
(MORE)
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JANET (CONT'D)
I’m not sure how much longer I can
contain you in here. Maybe you should
split up.
TAHANI-JANET
Good idea, we’ll all go to our neutral
corners, as it were.
(looking around)
Janet, can you make some corners?
Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Whimsical"
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The Fragmenting Janet - Overall Grade:
9.0
1013 INT. CONFERENCE ROOM/NEIL’S OFFICE - MOMENTS LATER (D1) 1013
Michael and Neil. Janet pops back in.
JANET
(aside to Michael)
You need to hurry. My molecular essence
is fragmenting, and it’s giving me the
worst headache.
MICHAEL
Okay, here’s a question: if Doug
Forcett’s not getting in, who is? Let’s
look at one more file -- someone who got
into the Good Place this year.
Neil slides over to a COMPUTER and TYPES...
NEIL
Okay. Why don’t we look at...
(reading)
No one. No one got in.
MICHAEL
...No one’s gotten in for a year?
NEIL
Correct.
MICHAEL
How about the last three years?
NEIL
(more typing)
Okay... doo doo doo... ah, here we go: no
one.
MICHAEL
...When was the last time someone got in?
NEIL
The last time a person got enough points
to get into the Good Place was... five
hundred and twenty-one years ago.
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Michael and Janet react, shocked. Janet puts her hands out in
front of her... her skin is CRACKING... she looks concerned.
1014 INT. JANET'S VOID - LATER (D1) 1014
Chidi-Janet sits alone. Jason-Janet comes over to him.
JASON-JANET
Yo homie -- you and Eleanor were fighting
before, and I couldn’t help but overhear.
(then)
Hey: if we hear with our ears, why’s it
called “butt overhearing?”
Chidi-Janet stays quiet.
JASON-JANET (CONT’D)
Bro, if you don’t like her, you should
just tell her.
CHIDI-JANET
It’s not about whether I “like” Eleanor.
I got into philosophy so I could make
sense of a world that almost never makes
sense... and that was before I learned I
died, and then un-died and then re-
died... I just can’t take one more thing
right now. It’s too much.
JASON-JANET
I’m gonna tell you a story. Back in
Jacksonville, there was a guy in my 80-
person dance crew named Stank Toby --
CHIDI-JANET
(suspicious)
Hang on. It was a 60-person dance crew.
JASON-JANET
(caught, desperate)
Uhhhh.... oh dip, what are “numbers?”
CHIDI-JANET
(furious)
You’re not Jason-Janet! You’re Eleanor-
Janet pretending to be Jason-Janet! That
is so wrong -- and so confusing!
ELEANOR-JANET (JASON CLOTHES)
What was I supposed to do?! You wouldn’t
talk to me. This seemed like the only
option.
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CHIDI-JANET
In what universe is any of this... the
only option?!
ELEANOR-JANET (JASON CLOTHES)
That’s not what I sound like, Jason! Get
out of here!
Jason-Janet exits. Eleanor-Janet BLOOPS her own clothes
back, and rubs her face, fed-up.
ELEANOR-JANET (CONT’D)
Look, you know what?! Just forget it!
What am I even doing? I'm chasing a dude
who isn't into me, I’m making myself
vulnerable for no reason -- I don't even
know who I am anymore!
Chidi-Janet looks at Eleanor-Janet, concerned --
CHIDI-JANET
...Uh oh. This is new.
REVEAL: Eleanor-Janet has changed into a DIFFERENT PERSON.
RANDOM PERSON 1
I’m so annoyed at myself! Gahhhh!
Stupid Eleanor!
Off Chidi-Janet, stunned...
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Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Whimsical"
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Janet's Void Crumbles - Overall Grade:
8.0
1015 INT. JANET’S VOID - SOMEWHERE - SAME TIME (D1) 1015
Tahani-Janet and Jason-Janet walk through a different part of
the void.
JASON-JANET
I know I asked you this before, but --
TAHANI-JANET
No, darling. This is not “where the Mac
and PC guys live.”
They happen upon a giant screen hanging in the void.
JASON-JANET
Whoa! Check out this dope flat-screen,
it’s air-mounted! You see this, Tahani?
The screen JUMPS to life -- a profile appears, with pictures
of Tahani and a list of everything that ever happened to her.
TAHANI-JANET
Oh my goodness... this must be where
Janet keeps all her information.
(realizing)
This screen can literally show us
anything that has ever happened --
JASON-JANET
(to the screen)
Cartoons. Cartoons. I think it’s
broken. “TV: play cartoons for Jason!”
TAHANI-JANET
Can’t believe that’s what you want to use
this for --
(noticing)
Oh my...
Jason’s profile comes up -- it’s covered with pink hearts,
and the name “Mrs. Janet Mendoza” written over and over in
cursive, like it was decorated by a lovestruck 14 year-old.
TAHANI-JANET (CONT’D)
Jason... Janet has a crush on you!
(looks closer)
Sorry, not just a crush... I think, in
one of the reboots, you two were married!
On the screen, we now see the WEDDING ANNOUNCEMENT of Jason
and Janet from #110. Jason-Janet reacts, surprised.
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1015 CONTINUED: 1015
JASON-JANET
Whoa. Married?
(then)
Ohhhh. This flatscreen must’ve been a
wedding present. It’s all starting to
make sense.
1016 INT. JANET’S VOID - CHIDI-JANET AND ELEANOR (D1) 1016
Chidi-Janet is looking at (the new) Eleanor, confused. She
still doesn’t know what’s going on.
RANDOM PERSON 1
This whole thing sucks, you know?
CHIDI-JANET
Eleanor... you... you’re not --
She is now another NEW PERSON -- a 53 year-old Chinese man.
RANDOM PERSON 2
The one thing I never wanted to do, ever,
for any reason, was follow some guy
around, like a lame puppy dog. I mean --
look at me, I don’t need to do that -- I
can get any guy I want!
CHIDI-JANET
Eleanor, just -- hang on --
Eleanor is yet ANOTHER RANDOM PERSON -- an 11 year-old boy.
RANDOM PERSON 3
What, dude? What? What do you want?
All around them, the walls of the void begin to CRACK. Janet
POPS IN and sees “Eleanor.”
JANET
What is going on?!
(notices)
Okay. Well. This is bad.
Eleanor is now an 80 year-old lady.
RANDOM PERSON 4
Why are you staring at me? Do I have a
zit on my nose or something?
JANET
Your sense of self is crumbling, and it’s
taking the void down with it.
She is now a 16 year-old girl.
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1016 CONTINUED: 1016
RANDOM PERSON 5
Great. So I don’t feel like myself for
two seconds and it breaks the universe?!
How come nothing went wrong when Chidi
freaked out about his identity for three
hours?
CHIDI-JANET
Because freaking out about everything is
my identity.
(faux cocky, wilting)
Not to brag!
JANET
You have to hold it together. Try to do
something Eleanor-y -- laugh at someone
who falls down, or show up at an event
underdressed and then get mad at everyone
else somehow. I’ll be right back --
Janet POPS OUT.
Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Whimsical"
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Janet(s) in Peril - Overall Grade:
9.0
1017 INT. ACCOUNTANT'S OFFICE - BULLPEN (D1) 1017
Neil walks Michael toward the exit... Janet pops in.
NEIL
Well! I gotta run -- we’re having a
little “thing” in the breakroom for
Marisol’s birthday. She’s turning 39
million -- again.
(chuckles)
So, if there’s nothing else...
MICHAEL
“If there’s nothing else?!” Neil,
please: be logical. Not one Good Place
resident in over five hundred years?!
Not Jonas Salk, not Harriet Tubman, not
one single Golden Girl?! The Bad Place
has hacked your system!
NEIL
(stern)
For the last time: no, they have not, and
frankly, I’m beginning to resent your
tone. If you have a problem, go back to
the Good Place and take it up with the
Committee. Now if you’ll excuse me,
there’s cake over there, and if I don’t
move quickly, Erika will get the last
corner piece!
He stomps off...
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1017 CONTINUED: 1017
MICHAEL
No, no, no. This can’t be happening. He
was supposed to tell us what to do! If
he can’t fix this, who’s going to?
JANET
You, Michael. It has to be you.
(off his look)
We keep wandering around these different
realms, expecting someone else to have
the answers. But no one does. You’re
the guy, Michael. You’re the only person
who can fix whatever’s wrong with the
afterlife.
Michael takes this in.
JANET (CONT’D)
But before we get into that, Eleanor’s
identity is shattering, inside my void,
and I might blow up, so I’m gonna need
you to grab a paperclip and marbelize me
like yesterday.
Janet’s face starts to crack! Light pours through the cracks!
MICHAEL
What will happen to the humans?
JANET
No idea, but I can’t take them out of my
void in the middle of this office, and if
we do nothing, everyone is gone-zo!
Marbelize me, get us somewhere safe, and
bring me back!
Michael looks around frantically --
MICHAEL
Paperclip! I need a paperclip!
(sees Matt)
Matt! Do you have a paperclip?!
MATT
(scared)
What are you gonna use it for?
1018 INT. JANET'S VOID - SAME TIME (D1) 1018
The ground shakes, walls shattering. Eleanor is now a JACKED
BODY-BUILDER.
RANDOM PERSON 6
Chidi? I’m scared.
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1018 CONTINUED: 1018
CHIDI-JANET
I know.
The walls keep cracking. Eleanor is now an OLD MAN.
RANDOM PERSON 7
What am I supposed to be doing right now?
I don’t remember. I’m having a hard
time... remembering...
Chidi-Janet gets an idea. Eleanor keeps becoming DIFFERENT
PEOPLE as Chidi-Janet talks:
CHIDI-JANET
Right. Memories! You need to remember
who you are:
(then)
You’re Eleanor Shellstrop, from Phoenix,
Arizona. Your favorite meal is shrimp
scampi, you listed your emergency contact
as Britney Spears as a longshot way of
meeting her, and your favorite movie is
“that clip of John Travolta saying ‘Adele
Dazeem’.” You flew halfway around the
world because you wanted to be a better
person, and it was very brave.
Within the ever-changing Eleanors, one out of every four is
Eleanor-Janet. Chidi-Janet sees that as a good sign...
CHIDI-JANET (CONT’D)
You’re sharp and you’re strong. You make
fun of me a lot -- you once called me a
“human snooze button” -- but you also
showed up in my classroom when I was
drowning in despair and canned chili, and
basically saved my life. You have very
high self-esteem, and a very low
tolerance for men who wear sandals, and
your worst nightmare is someone saying
something nice about you to your face,
but too bad, because you deserve it, and
I need to say it, because -- because --
Chidi-Janet waits, then sees ELEANOR-JANET and GRABS her and
KISSES HER. It’s a Janet kissing a Janet. The camera SWOOPS
AROUND them. Somewhere, during the kiss, through the magic
of computers, they become ACTUAL ELEANOR and ACTUAL CHIDI.
The cracks in the walls slow. Eleanor looks at herself...
ELEANOR
Nice work, bud.
(then)
(MORE)
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1018 CONTINUED: (2) 1018
ELEANOR (CONT'D)
Did you mean what you said, or did you
just say it because the world was ending?
CHIDI
...I really wanna play this cool, but I’m
afraid I’m gonna ruin it if I try to be
sexy.
(wilting)
I already ruined it. Saying the word
“sexy” is not sexy --
She kisses him again. The cracked walls start to heal. The
white void turns brilliant colors all around them.
Genres:
Comedy, Fantasy Tone:
"Frantic"
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The Good Place: Janet(s) - Overall Grade:
9.0
1019 INT. ACCOUNTANT’S OFFICE - BULLPEN - SAME TIME (D1) 1019
Michael is about to marbelize Janet, when --
JANET
Wait! I’m okay.
MICHAEL
...You’re sure?
JANET
Yes. I’m okay. Wait... uh oh...
(she GAGS)
They’re not Janets anymore... they’re...
them... and they’re not sitting well...
(gags)
Incoming!
She “barfs.” Eleanor, Chidi, Tahani, and Jason pop in, back
to their normal selves. Michael and a wobbly Janet watch.
JANET (CONT’D)
Oh man. Ugh. That was gross. I feel so
much better.
MICHAEL
On the bright side, they’re all here, and
they’re safe.
A loud ALARM SOUNDS.
MICHAEL (CONT’D)
-- From the old scary thing. Now there’s
a new scary thing.
END OF ACT THREE
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ACT FOUR
1020 INT. ACCOUNTANT’S OFFICE - BULLPEN (D1) 1020
ALARMS BLARE. Neil walks up, wearing a party hat, holding
some cake.
NEIL
Hey guys! I’m Neil. Welcome to
Accounting! Now it does look like the
four of you are interdimensional
fugitives, so I did go ahead and hit the
alarm. Sorry about that! On a lighter
note, we do have some cake left, if
you’re interested.
JASON
Yyyyyes!
TAHANI
Michael, what do we do?
MICHAEL
I’m sorry, guys. The Accountant was no
help --
NEIL
Rude.
MICHAEL
-- no one has gotten into the Good Place
in 500 years, and we have no plan.
Nobody’s coming to save us.
Michael locks the door, grabs the Book of Dougs. Looks around
frantically... gets an idea. Neil bangs on the window.
NEIL
Hey! You can’t take that!
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1021 CONTINUED: 1021
MICHAEL
I need one of you to volunteer to try
something outrageously insane, that will
either make you cease to exist or be
really fun.
JASON
That’s most of the things I’ve tried!
MICHAEL
That’s my guy. Get in the tube!
JASON
Oh hell yeah -- I love gettin’ in stuff!
He does. Michael SLAMS THE GREEN BUTTON, Jason FLIES UP into
the tube...
MICHAEL
Well... no way to know what happened to
him. The rest of you -- go!
1101 INT. GOOD PLACE OUTPOST - DAY (D1) 1101
We’re in an old quaint HOUSE. Camera pulls back to reveal a
large ANTIQUE MAILBOX.
We hear: THUNK! THUNK! THUNK! Six times, with accompanying
muffled “Ows!” And “Gahhs!”
DOOR is pushed open. Jason crawls out. Then Chidi, Tahani,
Eleanor, Michael and Janet -- like from a CLOWN CAR. They
look around.
ELEANOR
...Where are we?
MICHAEL
We’re in the Good Place.
ELEANOR
No offense dude, but you’ve told us a lot
of lies in the last 300 years, so for
real: where the fork are we?
(realizing)
Fork. Shirt. Ash-hole.
(hearing it, emotional)
Holy forking shirtballs... we’re in the
Good Place!
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Explanation: The Good Place draft demonstrates a strong comedic voice, imaginative premise, and well-developed world-building. However, the screenplay could benefit from a more compelling antagonist, a clearer sense of urgency in the central conflict, and a more satisfying resolution. Further exploration of the broken points system and its consequences would also enhance the overall narrative.