Breaking bad
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Overview
Genres: Drama, Crime, Thriller, Family, Slice of Life, Comedy
Setting: Contemporary, Various locations including a cow pasture, a high school, a car wash, a house, a kitchen, a meth lab, and a Winnebago
Overview: The screenplay garners a strong overall score of 8.15, reflecting its compelling character arcs, well-crafted dialogue, and exploration of complex themes. However, areas for improvement exist in pacing, originality, and fully maximizing the emotional impact.
Themes: Moral Conflict, Family Relationships, Power and Corruption, Identity, Consequences
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts revolve around Walt's internal struggle with his actions, his battle with cancer, and the consequences of his choices on his family. The stakes include his life, his family's safety, and his moral integrity.
Overall Mood: Dark, intense, suspenseful
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: The opening scene sets a dark and foreboding tone with a sense of desperation and danger.
Standout Features:
- Complex Characters: Walt's transformation from a mild-mannered teacher to a ruthless drug lord is a standout feature.
- Moral Ambiguity : The exploration of moral gray areas and the consequences of one's choices adds depth to the story.
- Intense Drama : The tension, suspense, and high-stakes situations create a gripping viewing experience.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$50-70 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-54, fans of crime dramas, thrillers, and character-driven narratives
Marketability: The intense drama, complex characters, and moral dilemmas make it highly marketable to a wide audience
The unique blend of genres, strong character development, and gripping storyline make it appealing to viewers seeking depth and complexity
The high production value, critical acclaim, and strong fan base contribute to its marketability
Profit Potential: High, due to the show's cult following, critical acclaim, and potential for syndication and merchandise sales
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
- Strong conceptualization with a high percentile ranking of 92.68%
- Emotional impact is well-executed, ranking at 71.13%
- Unpredictability is a standout feature, scoring an impressive 90.67%
- Formatting could benefit from attention, with a relatively lower percentile score of 37.95%
- Internal goal development could use further exploration, as indicated by its percentile score of 40.96%
The writer exhibits a strong conceptual foundation and a knack for creating unpredictable and emotionally impactful stories. Dialogue and character development could benefit from further refinement to complement the conceptual strengths.
Balancing Elements- Balancing predictability with the high unpredictability score could enhance the story's overall impact.
- Elevating the formatting score would complement the screenplay's strong conceptual basis.
Integrated
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay shows promise with its strong conceptualization, unpredictability, and emotional depth. Balancing elements and addressing areas for improvement can enhance its overall potential.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Scene Character Changes | 7.5 | 90 | Inception: 7.4 | fight Club: 7.5 |
Scene Concept | 8.4 | 88 | The Greatest Showman: 8.3 | fight Club: 8.4 |
Script Premise | 8.75 | 86 | Hot Fuzz: 8.50 | Erin Brokovich: 8.75 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.82 | 77 | Everything Everywhere All at Once: 7.79 | Breaking bad: 7.82 |
Scene Engagement | 9.00 | 76 | Almost Famous: 8.98 | fight Club: 9.00 |
Script Emotional Impact | 8.25 | 76 | Battlefield Earth: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
Scene Overall | 8.5 | 70 | The Greatest Showman: 8.4 | Casablanca: 8.5 |
Scene Originality | 8.86 | 70 | Her: 8.85 | Blade Runner: 8.86 |
Script Structure | 8.25 | 67 | Gladiator: 8.00 | Titanic: 8.25 |
Scene Characters | 8.4 | 65 | The Pianist: 8.3 | True Blood: 8.4 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.9 | 64 | Memento: 7.8 | glass Onion Knives Out : 7.9 |
Scene Story Forward | 8.3 | 64 | American Hustle: 8.2 | Titanic: 8.3 |
Scene Plot | 8.1 | 63 | 12 Monkeys: 8.0 | Vice: 8.1 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 7.9 | 63 | American Hustle: 7.8 | fight Club: 7.9 |
Scene External Goal | 7.39 | 62 | 12 Monkeys: 7.37 | Breaking bad: 7.39 |
Overall Script | 8.15 | 59 | Inside Out: 8.10 | Breaking bad: 8.15 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.8 | 58 | American Hustle: 7.7 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.8 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.8 | 55 | Birdman: 7.7 | Spy kids: 7.8 |
Script Theme | 8.25 | 48 | Stranger Things: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
Script Characters | 8.25 | 45 | The Hudsucker Proxy: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 |
Script Structure | 8.11 | 41 | Swingers: 8.10 | Casablanca: 8.11 |
Scene Formatting | 8.07 | 33 | Witness: 8.06 | Breaking bad: 8.07 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 27 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Pacing | 8.14 | 18 | Witness: 8.13 | Arsenic and old lace : 8.14 |
Script Visual Impact | 7.25 | 14 | Breaking bad, episode 306: 7.00 | There's something about Mary: 7.25 |
Script Conflict | 7.25 | 12 | Die Hard: 7.00 | fight Club: 7.25 |
Script Originality | 7.00 | 4 | 500 days of summer: 6.50 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.00 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its grit, intensity, dark humor, and focus on morally complex characters.
Best representation: Scene 14 - . This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases the writer's ability to blend dark humor with intense drama and create morally complex characters.
Memorable Lines:
- Hank: Meth labs are nasty on a good day -- but when you mix that stuff wrong, you wind up with mustard gas. (Scene 6)
- Walt: What if I showed you my secret? Every cook's got his recipe -- what if I taught you mine? Let us both live, I'll teach you. (Scene 13)
- Walt: Either that, or I turn you in. (Scene 7)
- Dupree: This is art. Mr. White (Scene 12)
- Walter White: My name is Walter Hartwell White. I live at 308 Belmont Avenue, Ontario, California 91764. I am of sound mind. (Scene 1)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a diverse range of writing styles, with influences from renowned screenwriters like Vince Gilligan, David Chase, and Aaron Sorkin. The focus on complex character development, moral ambiguity, realistic dialogue, and societal commentary is evident throughout the screenplay.
Style Similarities:
- Vince Gilligan
- David Chase
- Aaron Sorkin
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
Breaking Bad's pilot screenplay is a masterclass in character development, showcasing a dramatic transformation of its protagonist set against the backdrop of illegal drug manufacturing. The narrative is gripping, with a well-paced plot and rich dialogue that hooks the audience effectively.
- The screenplay offers a compelling transformation of the protagonist, Walter White, from a subdued high school teacher to a determined participant in the drug trade, providing a strong character arc. high
- The opening and closing scenes brilliantly bookend the pilot, starting and ending with high tension and action that effectively captures the viewer's attention. high ( Scene 1 Scene 14 )
- The dialogue is sharp and realistic, contributing to deep character development and enhancing the dark humor throughout the screenplay. high
- The use of setting in the isolated cow pasture adds a layer of tension and unpredictability, enhancing the overall mood and stakes of the narrative. medium ( Scene 12 )
- The pacing is meticulously crafted, balancing slower, character-driven scenes with fast-paced, high-stakes action sequences that drive the plot forward effectively. high
- Some scenes, particularly those involving drug manufacturing, might benefit from slight reductions to avoid potential pacing issues and ensure they contribute effectively to character and plot development. medium
- The screenplay could further explore the emotional impact of Walter's actions on his family, providing a deeper look into the personal consequences of his transformation. medium
- The transformation of Walter White is not only a personal journey but also a critique of societal expectations and the hidden potentials within a person. high
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay's premise effectively establishes a compelling and clear narrative, introducing a high school chemistry teacher's descent into the criminal underworld. However, there's potential to further enhance the originality and depth of the premise by exploring unique aspects of the drug trade and delving deeper into the moral complexities of Walt's transformation. See More
Structure: 8.25, The screenplay demonstrates a strong narrative structure, engaging plot, and coherent character arcs. It effectively sets the stage for the protagonist's transformation, deftly interweaving elements of tension, conflict, and suspense. While the premise and initial plot points are well-structured, there are opportunities to refine and enhance the storytelling dynamics to potentiate the screenplay's impact. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes and messages, highlighting the transformation of individuals amidst challenging circumstances and the consequences of one's actions. The themes are seamlessly integrated into the narrative, driving the character arcs and emotional depth. However, there is room for improvement in refining the message's clarity and resonance with the audience to fully harness its thematic potential. See More
Visual Impact: 7.25, The screenplay's visual imagery exhibits strengths in capturing the transformative journey of its main character, Walt, as he enters the criminal world. Vivid descriptions of meth preparation and the RV setting effectively immerse readers in the story. However, the screenplay could benefit from enhancing its consistency and originality to elevate the visual storytelling. See More
Emotional Impact: 8.25, The screenplay exhibits a strong foundation for emotional resonance, effectively immersing the audience in a compelling character-driven narrative. The depth of characterization and the richness of storytelling techniques contribute to the emotional depth, leaving room for further enhancement through the exploration of emotional complexities and transformative arcs. See More
Conflict: 7.25, The screenplay effectively establishes a central conflict and personal stakes for the protagonist, Walt. However, the overall presentation and integration of conflict and stakes throughout the narrative could be enhanced to deepen emotional engagement and heighten tension. See More
Originality: 7.00, The screenplay exhibits originality and creativity through its unconventional protagonist, the exploration of complex moral dilemmas, and the incorporation of scientific concepts. However, it could benefit from more innovative narrative techniques and a deeper exploration of themes. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Walter White, a high school chemistry teacher, flees the law in an RV with an unconscious passenger. As he struggles with his guilt, he records a video message for his family, expressing his love and hope for their understanding. With sirens approaching, he stands ready to confront the police.
- Walt and his family share an awkward breakfast, setting a tense tone for the day. Despite Skyler's reminder about his work hours, Walt is pressured by his boss, Amir, to work overtime at the car wash. Reluctantly, Walt agrees, leaving the scene with a sense of frustration.
- Walt, frustrated at work, drives home and notices a triple overpass. At home, his brother-in-law Hank boasts about a drug bust on TV, intriguing Walt with the large amount of cash seized.
- In this scene, Walt and Skyler interact playfully and intimately in their bedroom at night. Skyler bids on an eBay auction while Walt checks himself out in the mirror. They have a sexual encounter before Walt goes to Caltech the next day, where he reflects on his past achievements. The tone is intimate and nostalgic, with no major conflicts present.
- Walt anxiously awaits a diagnosis in an exam room and receives a devastating phone call. While undergoing tests, he learns he has stage 3 multiple myeloma and only two years to live. Emotionally overwhelmed, he leaves work abruptly and nearly has an accident. At home, he appears withdrawn, hiding his diagnosis from Skyler. Despite their financial concerns, Skyler remains unaware of Walt's inner turmoil.
- Walt Jr. defies his parents and watches a violent movie featuring a drug lord. Walt, lost in thought about his cancer diagnosis, ignores his son's behavior. The next morning, Walt pushes himself too hard while exercising, breaking the machine. Realizing the severity of his condition, Walt enlists Hank's help in raiding a meth lab, leading to the arrest of a suspect. Walt's decision to confront his situation marks a turning point in his journey.
- Walt, Hank, and Gomez witness Dupree's escape from a raided house. They confront him at a bungalow, where Walt offers to partner with him in meth production, promising more knowledge and money. Dupree is hesitant but intrigued, leaving their confrontation unresolved.
- While Skyler and Marie discuss Walt's concerning behavior, Walt secretly gathers lab equipment from the high school, facing potential consequences in the process.
- Walt arrives at Dupree's house with stolen lab equipment, eager to start cooking meth. However, Dupree is critical of Walt's methods and lack of safety precautions. They argue about proper cooking techniques and the risk of attracting attention. Ultimately, they decide not to cook at Dupree's house and consider renting an RV as a mobile meth lab.
- Walt withdraws $4,000 from his pension account, despite concerns from the bank manager. He gives the money to Dupree in a parking lot to buy an RV, claiming he is "awake." Walt helps his son, Walter Jr., get dressed after a fundraising walk, despite Walter Jr.'s struggles with cerebral palsy.
- In the men's department of a Target store, Walter, Jr. tries on new jeans while his parents, Skyler and Walt, watch. Walt, distracted by his thoughts, doesn't notice three high school-aged boys making fun of Walter, Jr. for his disability. Skyler is about to confront the boys, but Walt stops her. Instead, he walks over to the boys and confronts the biggest one, kicking him in the knee and standing on his ankle. The boy's friends pull him away, and the boys leave. Skyler and Walter, Jr. are amazed by Walt's actions, and Walt feels a sense of power and realizes he likes it.
- In the evening, Walt and Dupree successfully produce high-quality crystal meth in the Winnebago. Dupree is amazed by the quality and compares Walt to an artist. They decide to sell the meth and visit Krazy-8's house to gauge his interest. Krazy-8 is impressed but suspicious of Dupree, believing he betrayed his cousin Emilio. Despite the tension, they manage to leave Krazy-8's house successfully.
- In the woods, Walt's meth-cooking is interrupted by Krazy-8, Emilio, and Dupree. Krazy-8 offers Walt a job, but Emilio recognizes Walt as a DEA agent and threatens him. To save his life, Walt offers his secret meth recipe. While pretending to prepare, Walt plots his escape by unscrewing a red phosphorus bottle. He releases the smoke, incapacitating the cousins, and flees with Dupree. Krazy-8's cigarette ignites a brush fire, trapping Walt in his Winnebago. Donning a gas mask, Walt drives through the fire and crashes, escaping as the Winnebago burns.
- Walt contemplates shooting himself but is interrupted by the sound of fire engines passing by. He vomits after inhaling toxic gas, cleans up the mess, and hides the money and confession tape in the garage. Walt then has a passionate encounter with his wife.
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Character Walter White
Description Walter's transformation from a meek chemistry teacher to a ruthless criminal mastermind happens abruptly. His willingness to resort to violence and manipulation seems inconsistent with his initial characterization.
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Character Jesse Pinkman
Description Jesse's initial resistance to safety precautions and his flippant attitude towards the dangers of meth production seem out of character for someone who has been involved in the drug trade.
( Scene 8 (EXT. BUNGALOW - AFTERNOON) Scene 9 (EXT. BUNGALOW - GARAGE/BACK YARD - AFTERNOON) )
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Description The ease with which Walter is able to withdraw a large sum of money from his pension account without raising suspicion seems unrealistic.
( Scene 10 (INT. CREDIT UNION - AFTERNOON) )
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Description The connection between Walter witnessing Jesse's escape from the meth lab bust and Jesse later bringing Krazy-8 and Emilio to meet Walter is not explicitly explained, leaving a gap in the narrative logic.
( Scene 7 (EXT. TARGET HOUSE - MORNING) Scene 13 (EXT. WOODS - DAY) )
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Description Walter's video message to his family while in a state of panic feels overly formal and rehearsed, which could be attributed to the stress of the situation but might seem slightly unnatural.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Walt | Walt's character arc follows his transformation from a mild-mannered high school teacher to a cunning and resourceful criminal. Initially driven by a desire to provide for his family, Walt's moral compass begins to shift as he delves deeper into the drug trade. This leads to internal conflicts and a struggle between morality and ambition. As he becomes more involved in illegal activities, Walt's speech may become more assertive and calculated, reflecting his growing confidence and power. | The character arc for Walt is well-developed, showcasing his evolution from a conflicted teacher to a ruthless criminal. However, there could be more emphasis on the emotional toll of his decisions and the impact on his relationships with his family. Additionally, exploring the consequences of his actions in more depth could add complexity to his character arc. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more moments of vulnerability and introspection for Walt as he grapples with the moral implications of his choices. Showcasing the emotional turmoil and internal conflict he experiences can add depth to his character development. Additionally, exploring the repercussions of his actions on his family and loved ones can create more tension and drama in the storyline. |
Skyler | Skyler's character arc follows her journey from being a practical and cautious wife to a protective and assertive mother who stands up for her family. Throughout the screenplay, she learns to navigate financial challenges, understand Walt's behavior, and express her concerns and emotions more openly. Ultimately, Skyler evolves into a strong and resilient woman who prioritizes her family's well-being above all else. | The character arc for Skyler is well-developed, showcasing her growth and transformation throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more depth added to her internal struggles and conflicts, especially in relation to her relationship with Walt and the moral dilemmas she faces. Additionally, exploring her backstory and motivations further could enhance her character development. | To improve Skyler's character arc, consider delving deeper into her emotional journey and internal conflicts. Show more of her vulnerabilities and fears, especially in relation to Walt's actions and the impact on their family. Develop her relationships with other characters to provide more context and depth to her decisions and actions. Additionally, explore her past experiences and how they shape her present choices and behaviors. |
Dupree | Dupree starts off as a rebellious former student of Walt's, getting involved in illegal activities out of desperation. As he becomes more entrenched in the drug trade, he begins to question his choices and grapple with moral dilemmas. Ultimately, he faces a turning point where he must decide between continuing down a dangerous path or seeking redemption and a better future. | The character arc for Dupree is compelling, but it could benefit from more specific details about the challenges he faces and the internal struggles he experiences. Providing more depth to his moral dilemmas and showcasing his growth and development throughout the screenplay would enhance the impact of his character arc. | To improve the character arc for Dupree, consider incorporating specific scenes or moments that highlight his internal conflict and growth. Show his vulnerabilities and uncertainties more explicitly, and explore how his relationships with other characters influence his decisions. Additionally, consider adding a resolution to his arc that provides closure and a sense of transformation for Dupree. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Moral Conflict | Walt's struggle with the morality of his actions as he becomes involved in the drug trade. He is initially reluctant, but as he sees the potential benefits, he becomes more comfortable with his choices. | The theme of moral conflict is a central part of the show. Walt is a good man who is forced to make bad choices in order to protect his family. The show explores the consequences of his actions and the toll they take on his soul. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Moral Conflict:
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Family Relationships | The complex relationships between Walt and his family members. He is a loving husband and father, but he is also secretive and manipulative. His actions have a profound impact on his family, and they are forced to make difficult choices about how to deal with him. | The theme of family relationships is another important part of the show. Walt is a complex character who is both good and bad. His family loves him, but they are also aware of his flaws. The show explores the tensions and conflicts that exist within families, and the ways in which they can be overcome. | ||||||||||||
Power and Corruption | The corrupting influence of power on Walt. As he becomes more successful in the drug trade, he becomes more ruthless and manipulative. He is willing to do whatever it takes to protect his business, even if it means hurting others. | The theme of power and corruption is a common theme in crime dramas. The show explores the ways in which power can corrupt even the most well-intentioned people. Walt is a prime example of this. He starts out as a good man, but he is slowly corrupted by the power that comes with his drug empire. | ||||||||||||
Identity | Walt's struggle with his own identity. As he becomes more involved in the drug trade, he begins to lose sight of who he is. He becomes more isolated and paranoid, and he begins to make decisions that are out of character for him. | The theme of identity is a complex one. The show explores the ways in which our identities can be shaped by our experiences. Walt is a prime example of this. As he becomes more involved in the drug trade, he begins to lose sight of who he is. He becomes more isolated and paranoid, and he begins to make decisions that are out of character for him. | ||||||||||||
Consequences | The consequences of Walt's actions. As he becomes more involved in the drug trade, he puts himself and his family in danger. He also risks losing everything he has worked for. The show explores the ways in which our actions can have far-reaching consequences. | The theme of consequences is a common theme in crime dramas. The show explores the ways in which our actions can have far-reaching consequences. Walt is a prime example of this. As he becomes more involved in the drug trade, he puts himself and his family in danger. He also risks losing everything he has worked for. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to protect his family and ensure they know he loves them, despite the dangerous situation he finds himself in. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal is to evade law enforcement and escape the dangerous situation he is in with the RV, dead bodies, and money. |
Philosophical Conflict | The philosophical conflict revolves around the clash between personal integrity and societal expectations. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's evolution from a mild-mannered chemistry teacher to a morally ambiguous drug dealer is driven by his internal and external goals, as well as the philosophical conflict he faces. His decisions and actions shape his character development throughout the screenplay.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's goals and the philosophical conflict provide a framework for the narrative structure, driving the plot forward and creating tension and drama. The resolution of these goals and conflicts influences the storyline and the protagonist's journey.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals, along with the philosophical conflict, contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of morality, responsibility, sacrifice, and the consequences of one's actions. These elements add layers of complexity to the story and invite viewers to reflect on larger moral and ethical questions.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Breaking Dawn | Tense, Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Breakfast and a Car Wash | Serious, Intimate, Realistic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - A Triple Overpass and a Drug Bust | Tense, Dramatic, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Intimate Reflections | Tense, Intimate, Melancholic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - A Disturbing Diagnosis | Anxious, Overwhelmed, Matter-of-fact, Disconcerting | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Walt's Epiphany | Intense, Suspenseful, Serious, Dark | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8.5 | |
7 - The Encounter with Dupree | Suspenseful, Intense, Serious, Dark | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Domestic Chaos and Secret Preparations | Playful, Reflective, Serious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 3 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Meth Cooking Confrontation | Tense, Confrontational, Serious | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
10 - The Withdrawal | Intense, Serious, Tense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Walt's Transformation | Intense, Tense, Dramatic, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Meth Masterpiece | Tense, Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Walt's Escape | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic, Intense | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Despair and Passion | Despair, Relief, Excitement, Fear, Passion | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Intense atmosphere
- Strong character development
- Engaging plot progression
- Tension building
- Unexpected twists
Scene Weaknesses
- Some cliched dialogue
- Lack of external conflict
- Potential for violence
- Limited character development
- Slow pacing in some moments
Suggestions
- Focus on eliminating cliched dialogue and finding unique ways for characters to express themselves
- Introduce more external conflict to create higher stakes
- Take care when portraying violence and potentially triggering content
- Strive for deep, multi-dimensional character development throughout the story
- Consider the pacing of different scenes and look for opportunities to increase momentum
- Physical environment: The screenplay primarily depicts the suburban settings of California, characterized by sprawling cow pastures, residential neighborhoods, and typical American homes. These locations create a sense of familiarity and normalcy, juxtaposed with the underlying themes of secrecy, danger, and moral ambiguity that unfold within them.
- Culture: The screenplay portrays a culture focused on family dynamics, work-life balance, and societal expectations. The characters navigate the complexities of suburban life, striving for stability and conformity. However, the criminal activities and moral dilemmas they face challenge these societal norms, revealing the fragility and hypocrisy of their seemingly idyllic world.
- Society: The screenplay highlights various social classes and their interactions. The main characters navigate the lower-middle-class suburban lifestyle, while the drug-related activities involve interactions with criminals and law enforcement. This social hierarchy reflects the tensions and power dynamics that influence the characters' choices and actions.
- Technology: Technology plays a supporting role in the screenplay, primarily serving as a tool for communication and surveillance. The use of cell phones, computers, and surveillance equipment reflects the modern setting and the characters' attempts to monitor and control their surroundings. However, the misuse and manipulation of technology also contribute to the themes of deception and the erosion of trust.
- Characters influence: The screenplay's world elements shape the characters' experiences and actions in significant ways. The physical environment of the cow pasture and the rural setting provides a sense of isolation and anonymity, facilitating the characters' illicit activities. The suburban neighborhoods and domestic settings highlight the contrast between their normal lives and their involvement in the criminal underworld. The societal expectations and the presence of law enforcement create a sense of pressure and risk, influencing their choices and interactions.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by establishing the setting and context for the characters' actions. The cow pasture and the rural setting provide the backdrop for the initial meth-cooking operation, setting the stage for the unfolding events. The suburban neighborhoods and domestic settings serve as the facade behind which the characters' criminal activities occur. The juxtaposition of these seemingly ordinary locations with the dark and dangerous underbelly of the drug trade creates a sense of unease and suspense.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring the themes of duality and the blurring of moral boundaries. The contrast between the peaceful cow pastures and the dangerous meth-cooking operation highlights the fragility of innocence and the ease with which individuals can be drawn into a life of crime. The suburban settings confront the characters with the consequences of their actions, forcing them to confront their own morality and the impact of their choices on their families and community.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by its grit, intensity, dark humor, and focus on morally complex characters. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by adding depth and complexity to the characters and themes, as well as creating a sense of tension and suspense. |
Best Representation Scene | 14 - Despair and Passion |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases the writer's ability to blend dark humor with intense drama and create morally complex characters. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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High Emotional Impact Scenes | Scenes with high emotional impact tend to have higher scores in other categories, such as plot, characters, and dialogue. This suggests that the author is able to create scenes that are both emotionally engaging and well-written. |
Suspenseful Scenes Drive the Story | Scenes that are suspenseful tend to have higher scores in the 'Move story forward' category. This suggests that the author is able to use suspense to keep the reader engaged and invested in the story. |
Character Changes Enhance Scene Quality | Scenes that include character changes tend to have higher overall grades. This suggests that the author is able to use character development to enhance the quality of their scenes. |
Tense Scenes Lack Emotional Depth | Scenes that are tense tend to have lower scores in the emotional impact category. This suggests that the author may need to focus on developing the emotional depth of their tense scenes. |
Dialogue Needs Improvement | Many scenes have lower scores in the dialogue category. This suggests that the author may need to improve their dialogue writing skills. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The writer demonstrates a strong foundation in storytelling and character development. The scenes effectively convey tension, conflict, and emotional depth, creating a compelling narrative that engages the audience. The dialogue is sharp and authentic, and the action sequences are well-paced and exciting. However, there are opportunities to enhance the screenplay's overall structure, character development, and pacing.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Screenplay | Read 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into structuring scenes, creating compelling characters, and developing engaging narratives, which can enhance the writer's overall craft. |
Video | Watch behind-the-scenes footage of similar TV shows or films | Observing the creative process and techniques of experienced screenwriters and filmmakers can offer valuable lessons and inspiration. |
Exercise | Practice writing character profiles and backstoriesPractice In SceneProv | Developing detailed character profiles helps writers deeply understand their characters' motivations, desires, and conflicts, leading to more authentic and compelling character arcs. |
Exercise | Analyze scene structure in well-written screenplaysPractice In SceneProv | Studying how established screenwriters structure their scenes, establish goals, create conflict, and resolve scenes can enhance the writer's understanding of effective scene construction. |
Exercise | Practice writing scenes with a clear beginning, middle, and endPractice In SceneProv | This exercise helps writers develop a strong sense of scene structure and ensures that each scene has a clear purpose and impact on the narrative. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Breaking of the Fourth Wall | Walt records a video message for his family, stating his love for them and that he had them in his heart while wearing a gas mask. | In a breaking of the fourth wall event, a character will directly communicate or interact with the audience. This can be done through gestures, speech, or even eye contact. Basically, anything where the character acknowledges the existence of an audience. |
Flashback | The scene takes place in the White House kitchen in the morning where Walt, Skyler, and Walter, Jr. have breakfast. | A flashback is a scene that interrupts the present timeline of a story to show an event that happened in the past. Flashbacks can be used to provide backstory, foreshadow future events, or create suspense. |
Foreshadowing | Walt becomes intrigued by the large amount of cash seized in a drug bust on TV and decides to start cooking meth. | Foreshadowing is a technique used in storytelling to hint at future events. It can be done through dialogue, action, or symbolism. |
Chekhov's Gun | Walt uses a gun from one of the dead Mexicans to shoot the first cop he sees. | Chekhov's gun is a principle of storytelling that states that every element of a story must be necessary, and if it is not necessary, it should be removed. In other words, if a gun is introduced in a story, it must be used at some point. |
Macguffin | The RV is used as a mobile meth lab. | A Macguffin is an object, person, or event that is used to drive the plot of a story, but is not essential to the story's main conflict. |
Red Herring | Walt is initially suspected of being a DEA agent, but it is later revealed that he is a meth cook. | A red herring is a clue or piece of information that is introduced into a story to mislead the reader or viewer. |
Deus Ex Machina | Walt is able to escape from the RV by unscrewing the top off the red phosphorus bottle. | A Deus Ex Machina is a plot device that is introduced into the story at the last moment to solve a problem that cannot be solved by any other means. |
Anticlimax | Walt's plan to shoot the first cop he sees is thwarted when the RV crashes. | An anticlimax is a plot device that occurs when the climax of a story does not meet the expectations of the reader or viewer. |
Catharsis | Walt has a passionate encounter with his wife after he escapes from the RV. | Catharsis is a moment of emotional release that occurs at the end of a story. |
Moral of the Story | The story shows how Walt's decision to start cooking meth leads to his downfall. | A moral of the story is a lesson or message that is conveyed through the story. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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6 | Hank: Meth labs are nasty on a good day -- but when you mix that stuff wrong, you wind up with mustard gas. |
13 | Walt: What if I showed you my secret? Every cook's got his recipe -- what if I taught you mine? Let us both live, I'll teach you. |
7 | Walt: Either that, or I turn you in. |
12 | Dupree: This is art. Mr. White |
1 | Walter White: My name is Walter Hartwell White. I live at 308 Belmont Avenue, Ontario, California 91764. I am of sound mind. |
Some Loglines to consider:
A high school chemistry teacher turned methamphetamine manufacturing drug dealer partners with a former student to secure his family's future. |
When diagnosed with terminal cancer, a struggling teacher decides breaking bad is his only option for providing for his family. |
Under the crushing weight of his health and finances, a teacher exploits his chemistry skills to craft the purest meth on the market. |
Facing death, a high school teacher defies both law and morality to build a meth empire with a dropout. |
From chalkboards to meth labs, a dying man’s quest for survival leads him down a dark path. |
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