Midsommar
Executive Summary
Poster
Overview
Genres: Drama, Horror, Mystery, Thriller, Psychological Thriller, Psychological, Relationship, Romance, Psychological Horror
Setting: Present day, The Hårga farmstead, a remote village in Sweden
Overview: Dani, a young woman reeling from a personal tragedy, travels to Sweden with her boyfriend Christian and his friends for a midsummer festival. They arrive at a secluded village where a peculiar, welcoming community practices ancient pagan traditions. While Dani initially feels uneasy about the rituals and their unsettling intensity, she slowly becomes drawn into the community's warmth and sense of belonging. However, as she experiences the full breadth of their customs, she begins to question the true nature of their welcoming embrace, ultimately discovering a horrifying truth about the community's dark intentions.
Themes: Grief and Loss, Isolation and Connection, Cultural Rituals and Belonging, Manipulation and Control, Mental Health and Breakdown
Conflict and Stakes: Dani and Christian's journey into the dark secrets of the Hårgan community, where they are increasingly caught in a web of ritualistic violence and their own moral dilemmas, with their lives and relationship at stake.
Overall Mood: Dark, suspenseful, and unsettling, with a surreal and ritualistic undercurrent.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 27: A sense of dread and horror permeates the scene as the elders are brutally murdered in the ritualistic act of Attestupans.
- Scene 48: The scene has a dark, mystical, and unsettling tone as Christian is intoxicated and engaged in a ritualistic act with Maja, while Dani witnesses the scene with horror and disgust.
- Scene 51: The scene is a horrifying spectacle, with Christian trapped in the burning bear carcass and Ulf consumed by flames, creating a sense of intense dread and terror.
- Scene 56: The tone is overwhelmingly surreal and unnerving as the sacrifices are announced and Christian is chosen by Dani, creating a sense of impending doom and unsettling power dynamics.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The unsettling and disturbing depiction of a secluded community with dark secrets and ritualistic practices. The film draws inspiration from folk horror, using elements of paganism and folklore to create a uniquely unsettling atmosphere.
- Plot Twist: The revelation of the true nature of the Hårgan community and their disturbing rituals, including the sacrifice of individuals and animals. The film gradually reveals the horrors of this community, building tension and suspense, and ultimately culminating in a shocking climax.
- Distinctive Setting: The remote and visually striking Hårgan farmstead in Sweden, which serves as the backdrop for the story and adds a layer of visual intrigue and atmosphere.
- Unique Characters: The characters are complex and morally ambiguous, each with their own motivations and desires. The film explores the complexities of human nature, questioning the boundaries between good and evil.
- Genre Blend: The film blends elements of horror, psychological thriller, and arthouse cinema, creating a unique and disturbing experience for the audience. It uses visual and narrative techniques inspired by folk horror and cult cinema, which adds a layer of originality to the story.
- Innovative Idea: The film's exploration of cultural clashes, the power of rituals, and the darkness within human nature, combined with the striking visuals and unsettling atmosphere, offers a unique and thought-provoking experience.
Comparable Scripts:
- Midsommar (2019)
- The Wicker Man (1973)
- The Ritual (2017)
- Hereditary (2018)
- The Village (2004)
- The Blair Witch Project (1999)
- The Witch (2015)
Writing Style:
The screenplay leans heavily towards a psychological horror and psychological thriller style, characterized by intense emotional moments, unsettling atmosphere, and explorations of dark themes, societal rituals, and cultural clashes. There is a strong emphasis on character-driven narratives and dialogue that reveals internal conflicts and complex relationships.
Style Similarities:
- Ari Aster
- Robert Eggers
- Jordan Peele
Pass/Consider/Recommend
Highly Recommend
Explanation: Midsommar is a masterfully crafted horror screenplay that utilizes stunning visuals, unsettling atmosphere, and compelling character arcs to deliver a truly unique and unforgettable experience. The story masterfully blends psychological horror with folk horror, creating a chillingly believable world where traditions collide with modern anxieties. While the screenplay does contain some minor pacing issues, its strengths far outweigh any weaknesses. It is a highly recommendable script for its originality, disturbing themes, and gripping narrative.
USP: The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its ability to intertwine psychological horror with cultural commentary, presenting a narrative that is both unsettling and thought-provoking. The vivid depiction of rituals and the transformation of the protagonist, Dani, into a figure of power within a foreign culture, sets it apart from typical horror narratives, making it compelling for audiences interested in deeper psychological themes and cultural explorations.
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$15-25 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-45, fans of horror, psychological thrillers, and cult films, interested in folklore and mythology, with a particular appeal to audiences who enjoyed films like Midsommar
Marketability: The film has a unique premise and a strong visual style, combining elements of horror, psychological thriller, and folklore. It has the potential to attract a wide audience, particularly those who enjoyed films like Midsommar, and generate buzz for its disturbing and thought-provoking themes. The film could also appeal to fans of Nordic Noir and arthouse cinema.
The film presents a compelling story with strong characters and a gripping narrative. It also explores relevant social themes, such as cultural clashes, the dark side of human nature, and the power of ritual. This could appeal to audiences interested in these topics and contribute to the film's overall marketability.
The film has a strong hook in its premise and its striking visual style. It uses a blend of genres, combining horror, thriller, and elements of arthouse cinema, which could appeal to a wider audience. It also has potential to attract attention from film festivals and generate critical acclaim, further boosting its marketability.
Profit Potential: High, the unique premise and disturbing visuals have potential for strong box office performance. The film could generate significant interest in home video and streaming platforms, making it a lucrative project for investors.
Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a potent blend of psychological realism and unsettling horror, creating a distinct atmosphere of dread and mystery. The dialogue is often intimate, revealing complex emotional dynamics and inner turmoil. The narrative is punctuated by vivid sensory details, immersing the audience in the surreal and haunting world of the Hårga community. The direction, although not explicitly detailed, suggests a heightened sense of visual storytelling, using impactful imagery to amplify the unsettling nature of the events.
Best representation: Scene 9 - The Ant-Infested Woods. This scene is the best representation because it masterfully blends psychological horror with vivid imagery and unsettling descriptions. The scene showcases the writer's ability to create intense emotional moments, employing sensory details to amplify the protagonist's fear and disorientation. The use of the outhouse as a confined space, the flickering candlelight, and the grotesque visual transformation of Dani's reflection effectively evoke a sense of claustrophobia and unease. This scene encapsulates the unique voice of the screenplay, highlighting its ability to unsettle and provoke the audience with a blend of psychological realism and disturbing imagery.
Memorable Lines:
- Josh: You think I don’t know what you’re doing? It’s actually kind of outrageously unsubtle. The fact that you’re being this bald about it. I’m honestly impressed. (Scene 19)
- Dani: Nothing means anything! We’re just alone. (Scene 10)
- Dani: I love you. (Scene 1)
- Dani: NO!!! (Scene 21)
- Dani: She has surrendered to a joy known only by the insane. She has lost herself completely, and she is finally free. It is horrible and it is beautiful. (Scene 42)
Characters
Dani:A young woman grieving the death of her sister, who is drawn to the mysterious Hårga community
Christian:Dani's boyfriend, an anthropology student fascinated by the Hårgan culture, but who is increasingly disturbed by what he witnesses
Pelle:A Hårgan man who guides the group and tries to explain their customs to Dani and Christian
Siv:A Hårgan elder, a powerful and enigmatic woman who plays a central role in the community
Sten:Another Hårgan elder, who acts as a spokesperson for the community and defends their traditions
Josh:A friend of Christian, an anthropology student who is researching the Hårgan community
Mark:A friend of Christian, who is more concerned with partying and enjoying the experience than understanding the culture
Maja:A young Hårgan woman who is attracted to Christian and becomes a point of tension in his relationship with Dani
Ingemar:Pelle's brother, who is also a member of the Hårgan community
Ulf:A Hårgan man who is deeply devoted to the community's traditions and enforces them with violence
Story Shape
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall Grade | Concept | Plot | Originality Score | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - A Sister's Cry | Anxious, Intimate, Concerned | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Distant Cry | Anxious, Conflicted, Intense, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Unraveled Ties | Tense, Somber, Foreboding | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - A Sudden Departure and an Unexpected Offer | Tense, Emotional, Defensive, Desperate | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Unexpected Arrival | Anxious, Awkward, Sensitively, Mock-menacing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Driving Through Sweden | Tense, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - A Midsummer Night's Trip | Tense, Emotional, Introspective | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Dani's Discomfort | Tense, Anxious, Eerie, Intense, Disturbing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Eyes of the Beast | Tense, Disturbing, Emotional, Intense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - The Ant-Infested Woods | Fearful, Panicked, Intense, Disconnected | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Arrival at the Hårga Farmstead | Eerie, Mysterious, Foreboding, Ceremonial | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Feast of Traditions | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Reverent, Charged | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - A Dance of Tensions | Tense, Eerie, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Uneasy Revelations at Håрga Estate | Tense, Mysterious, Unsettling, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - A New World, New Traditions | Suspenseful, Dark, Mysterious, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Unease in the Village | Tense, Mysterious, Unnerving, Emotional, Curious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - The Journey to Ättestupan | Tense, Disturbing, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - The Ritual of the Cliffs | Disturbing, Ethereal, Horrified, Contemplative, Traumatized | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Stolen Research | Tense, Confrontational, Emotional, Intense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Secrets and Conflict at the Farmstead | Tense, Intrigued, Uneasy, Love-stricken, Annoyed | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - A Ceremony of Fire and Water | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Cultural | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Growing Divide | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational, Defensive | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Morning Rituals and Rising Tension | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - The Sacrifice and the Comfort | Tense, Anxious, Emotional, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - The Aftermath of Sacrifice | Disturbing, Intense, Confrontational, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
26 - Simon's Departure and Christian's Indifference | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - A Taste of the Unknown | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Tensions at the Fire Temple Feast | Disturbing, Tense, Unsettling, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - The Deceptive Encounter | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Macabre | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Missing Book, Missing Boys | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious, Uneasy | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - The Dance of Defiance | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Trippy, Emotional | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Conflicted Loyalties | Tense, Uncomfortable, Mysterious, Conflicted | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Maypole Mayhem | Disturbing, Tense, Hallucinatory, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Dani's Coronation | Disturbing, Tense, Conflicted, Hallucinatory, Celebratory | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - A Throne of Uncertainties | Disturbing, Hallucinatory, Conflicted, Eerie, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - The May Queen's Departure | Disturbing, Tense, Mysterious, Surreal, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Rituals of the Unseen | Disturbing, Tense, Surreal, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Twilight Descent | Disturbing, Tense, Surreal, Intense, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 10 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - The Horror Unfolds | Disturbing, Traumatic, Eerie, Suspenseful | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - The Chosen Sacrifice | Terror, Sadness, Confusion, Shock, Intense Emotion | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - The Burning of Christian | Disturbing, Tense, Surreal, Dark, Mysterious | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Ascension Through Fire | Horror, Drama, Suspense, Tragic, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 10 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Scene 1 - A Sister's Cry
Hälsingland, North Sweden. We cycle through a series of
beautifully composed midday landscapes. None of them feature
people or human habitation.
A spare Swedish LULLABY plays over this quiet montage. This
is the song of the Hårgas. When it concludes, we CUT HARD TO:
2 EXT. HOUSE - MINNESOTA - NIGHT 2
A beautiful suburban home, bathed in vivid moonlight. The
neighborhood is very quiet.
3 INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT 3
A MAN and WOMAN (early sixties) lay asleep in bed. They are
extremely still.
The PHONE rings. The Man and Woman do not stir. After a few
rings, the ANSWERING MACHINE takes it. (Next to the answering
machine is a photo of a family: the man and woman standing
happily with their two teenaged daughters.)
ANSWERING MACHINE (V.O.)
Hello. You’ve reached --
MAN & WOMAN (V.O.)
-- the Ardor residence.
ANSWERING MACHINE (V.O.)
Please leave your message at the
tone. When you’re finished with
your message, press pound.
BEEP. Enter the voice of a YOUNG WOMAN:
YOUNG WOMAN (V.O.)
Hey mom, hey dad, it’s Dani. Sorry
to call so late. I’m just checking
in to make sure everyone’s okay. I
got kind of a scary email from
Terri and it sounded like you guys
were having some sort of conflict?
Anyway, I just got a little
worried, so call me when you can,
and if there’s anything I can do,
just please know that I’m here.
Okay. All right. I love you.
Beside their bed is a PHOTO of one of the daughters. She
wears a beaming smile.
4 INT. APARTMENT LIVING ROOM - BROOKLYN, NY - NIGHT 4
The young woman lowers the cell from her ear. This is
DANI (25), a beautiful but delicate brunette. (She is the
girl from the photo). She hangs up, and turns to her
laptop. An EMAIL from Terri Ardor, titled “dear dani,” is
displayed. It reads:
i cant anymore - everything’s black - mom and dad
are coming too. goodbye.
Dani stares at this, anxiety rising. She picks up her phone,
hesitates, and then calls Christian.
Four rings. CHRISTIAN (25) answers. The rest of this scene
will be shot in a VERY TIGHT CLOSE-UP of Dani.
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4 CONTINUED: 4
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Hi...!
Dani affects a care-free tone:
DANI
Hey sweetie. What you up to?
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Oh, just smoked some resin at Mark’s
and now we’re getting pizza.
DANI
Oh nice.
In the b.g., we hear a young man repeating “hi Dani, hi Dani,
hi Dani...”
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Yeah - he’s saying hi right now,
over and over.
DANI CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Hi Mark! (off-phone)
“Hi Mark.”
DANI
So I was just calling to see if you
were still wanting to get together.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Oh - did we talk about doing
something tonight?
DANI
I mean, not concretely. I was just
seeing.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
(ambivalent)
Uh, well - okay. Yeah. I should be
able to swing by.
DANI CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
All right...! Yeah. Okay... How’s the
sister situation?
DANI
Well...I’ve now sent her three
emails and still no response. I’m
starting to get a little nervous.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
I’m sure it’s fine.
DANI CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Yeah. Probably. I hope so. She does this every other
day, Dani. And only because
you let her.
DANI CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Well, I don’t LET her. She’s
bipolar. I know, but you do, though,
babes. You go straight to
crisis mode.
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4 CONTINUED: 4
DANI
Well - but she’s my sister. And even
you admit this last email was
different...
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Okay, but is it, though? It’s still
another clear ploy for attention -
just like every other panic attack
she’s given you.
Dani looks like she wants to argue with this. She stifles it.
DANI
Okay. Yeah. You’re right. You are
right.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
The more you respond, the more she’s
encouraged to keep this crap up.
DANI
No, I do know you’re right. I just
needed to be reminded. Thank you.
I’m really lucky to have you.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.) DANI (CONT'D)
Me too. I love you.
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
...So do I.
DANI
Okay. See you later?
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
Yup.
DANI
Okay. “Bye Mark!”
CHRISTIAN (V.O.)
“Bye Mark.”
DANI
All right. Love you. Bye.
Dani hangs up. Her eyes are wide with insecurity.
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Scene 2 - Distant Cry
Dani stands in the kitchen, mid-phone conversation.
FRAUGHT. She paces when she’s not speaking.
DANI
It’s just in his tone - you can hear
it. It’s like he’s trying to work up
the nerve to say something.
GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
So be direct! Confront him!
Dani has opened a cabinet to pull out a pill bottle.
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5 CONTINUED: 5
DANI GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
Well - what if I scared him?
I’m always roping him into my
family crap... Oh - how do you rope him in?
I’m always leaning on him!
I even called him today in That’s what he’s there for!
tears because my sister sent
me another scary email. What
if I’m scaring him off?
Dani swallow one of the pills.
GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
What did your sister write?
DANI
Oh - just some ominous bullshit! She
does it all the time! It’s torture,
and I’ve been completely leaning on
him for support! What if I
overwhelmed him and now he thinks I
have too much baggage?
Dani returns the prescription bottle. The label reads ATIVAN.
GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
Well, if that’s the case, then good
riddance! Right?
DANI
No! Not if I went too far! What if
I leaned too heavily?
Dani has returned to her laptop.
GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
You didn’t! He should be there when
you need him.
Dani begins hastily composing an EMAIL to her sister Terri.
DANI GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
But what if I need him too
often? If it becomes a chore? Then he's not the right guy.
Because it shouldn't ever be
a chore. Would it be a chore
if he leaned on you?
Dani breaks from writing to respond:
DANI
But he never asks for anything from
me! I've never even seen him cry!
So I'm the only one leaning!
GIRLFRIEND (V.O.)
Or the only one opening up! The
only one making yourself
vulnerable. That's intimacy.
As the friend says that, Dani finishes typing. Her email
reads: "PLEASE write me back, Terri. You can't just write me
something like that and then disappear. I’m worried sick.
Please write back. Please."
Dani’s phone beeps with an INCOMING CALL. It’s an UNKNOWN
NUMBER.
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6 INT. PIZZA PARLOR - NEW YORK, NY - NIGHT 6
A grubby pizza parlor. Outside the window looms a purple NYU
sign.
CHRISTIAN, very handsome and fit, sits at a booth. Beside him
are his friends MARK (26, droll, shaggy hair), JOSH (27, a
skinny, sometimes snobbish academic), and PELLE (26), a nice-
looking Swedish exchange student. Pelle doodles on his napkin
(drawing the flowers on the table).
Mark is currently lecturing a despondent Christian, who
begins with his face in his arms (on the table).
MARK
Dude: you need to stop sitting on
the fence with this.
CHRISTIAN
But what if I end up regretting it
and then I can’t get her back?
MARK CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
You don’t want her back! I might!
MARK
So then you can bitch to us for that
day about how much you regret it,
and we'll remind you AGAIN that
you’ve been wanting out of this
stupid relationship for the last
year, and then you can find some new
chick who actually likes sex and who
doesn’t drag you through a million
hoops a day.
Christian is thinking about this. Extremely conflicted. Josh
takes a break from reading his dog-eared copy of Primitive
Mentality (by Lucien Lévy-Bruhl) to ask:
JOSH
Do you think a masochistic part of
you might be playing out this drama
to distract you from the work you
actually need to be doing?
CHRISTIAN
(prepared to be offended)
And what work do I actually need to
do, Josh?
JOSH
(quietly, almost to
himself)
Your prospectus maybe? Your PhD...?
Christian clearly doesn’t want to be told his priorities by
Josh. Before he can snap back, an attractive WAITRESS (early
20s) brings over the check.
WAITRESS
Whenever you guys are ready.
PELLE
(with Swedish accent)
Thank you.
She SMILES -- at Christian.
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WAITRESS
Thank you.
She HOLDS the smile with Christian and walks bashfully off.
Mark definitely caught that.
MARK
Dude. You could be getting that
girl pregnant right now.
PELLE MARK (CONT'D)
And don’t forget all the
Swedish women you can
impregnate in June. Yeah, dude - don’t forget all
the Swedish milkmaids.
Christian’s PHONE rings. He checks. It’s DANI. He deflates.
MARK (CONT’D)
Who is that?
Christian doesn’t respond.
MARK (CONT’D)
That’s not her again? Seriously?
Christian lets the call go.
MARK (CONT’D)
That’s ridiculous, dude. She needs
a therapist.
CHRISTIAN
She has one.
MARK
So she should call him! That’s
insane, dude. She’s using you.
The phone starts ringing again. Christian checks it. “Dani
again.”
MARK (CONT’D)
Oh my God.
Christian answers. He rises from the booth to get some
privacy.
CHRISTIAN
Hello?
On the other end: an extended, agonized MOAN.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Dani?
DANI (V.O.)
(distantly)
...no, no, no, no, no, no, no...
CHRISTIAN
Sweetheart? What’s going on?
But now there’s only heavy, frightening CRYING on the other
end. It’s a deep, horrible cry. One of pure animal grief.
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CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
(now scared)
What’s happening, baby? Please talk
to me.
The crying has curdled into a sustained WAIL OF ANGUISH.
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Scene 3 - Unraveled Ties
The house from the beginning (scene 2).
Two CARS are parked. Their engines hum quietly. A FIREFIGHTER
opens one car’s door and turns OFF the ignition.
We now reveal that the end of a GARDENING HOSE has been
taped to one car’s EXHAUST PIPE. A second hose has been
taped to the other car’s exhaust pipe. Both hoses TRAIL out
of the garage and INTO the house...
8 INT. HALLWAY - CONTINUOUS 8
One gardening hose leads to a BEDROOM DOOR. The door is now
open, but the end of the hose has been TAPED to the bottom...
9 INT. BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS 9
The bedroom of the sleeping MAN and WOMAN (in their 60s, from
the beginning). It is very clear now that they are DEAD.
Two police officers survey the room.
HARD CUTS to the man and woman being ZIPPED UP into body bags.
10 INT. TERRI’S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 10
TERRI (24), Dani’s sister, sits on the floor of her bedroom,
beside her desk. The end of the other gardening hose has been
DUCT-TAPED TO HER MOUTH. A mess of vomit has dried around the
edges of the hastily applied tape.
On Terri’s desk: her LAPTOP. It is open to the EMAIL THREAD
between her and Dani. In the bottom right corner of the
screen: “3 New Messages from Dani Ardor.”
11 EXT. STREET - BROOKLYN, NY - NIGHT 11
Dreamy snowfall in Brooklyn.
Christian, bundled up in layers, RUNS down the street. He’s
approaching DANI’S BUILDING, but even as he rushes, he’s not
going as fast as he possibly could. There’s an ambivalence in
his stride.
He enters the front door of Dani’s building.
12 INT. DANI’S APARTMENT - NIGHT 12
Wide on the LIVING ROOM. We’re centered on the COUCH, where
Christian sits. Dani has crumbled there, her head shaking
violently against Christian’s lap as she WEEPS. Behind them:
a WINDOW showcases snowfall against the dark night.
Dani’s sobs are possessed of a profound despair. It’s so
intense that it looks painful - dangerous even.
We are pushing in on this, toward them. Christian’s eyes are
wide with worry. A worry that goes beyond Dani’s well-being.
He stares into space, imagining a future that he’s being
chained to. He looks TRAPPED.
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We continue pushing toward them until we have pushed PAST
them. The window behind them FILLS our frame.
Through the window - HEAVY SNOW raging in a black vacuum. We
hold on this as our OPENING CREDITS ROLL, accompanied by
intense, groaning score.
After the credits, we SLAM CUT TO:
DAYLIGHT. We are still looking out the window, but it’s now
late afternoon. LATE SPRING.
13 INT. DANI’S BEDROOM - LATE AFTERNOON - 6 MONTHS LATER 13
Dani lies on her bed, fully clothed. Her eyes are numb as she
stares at the wall.
A KNOCK at the door. A well-dressed Christian pops his head
in. He’s grown a beard since we last saw him.
CHRISTIAN
Hey babers. How we feeling?
DANI
(looking to him)
Hey.
(sitting up)
I’m up.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
I’m just going to that party
for like 45 minutes. You
should keep sleeping. Oh - I’ll come with you...!
CHRISTIAN
(hesitates)
You sure you got enough rest?
DANI
I wasn’t sleeping anyway.
Christian pauses briefly, as if this clashes with his
plans.
CHRISTIAN
Okay, great. I’ll just be at the
door.
DANI
Okay. I’ll just get dressed.
Christian nods for a little too long, then “smiles” and
leaves the room. Dani rises. Stands for a moment. Heavy.
14 INT. APARTMENT - EVENING 14
A PARTY in a brownstone full of circulating twenty-
somethings.
Dani stands with Christian, who chats with Josh, Mark
(holding two beers), Pelle, and a stoned HIPSTER GUY (26).
HIPSTER GUY
I’m fucking dreading the summer.
Stuck in shit-ass Boulder while my
dad watches Law & Order all day.
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PELLE
(to Mark)
You have to work at your mom’s shop
when we all get back from our trip,
right?
Dani squints with curiosity. Christian suddenly looks
nervous.
HIPSTER GUY
Oh - you guys are going somewhere?
JOSH PELLE
To Sweden! Hälsingland.
MARK
Mr. Pelle’s invited us for an
authentic hippie midsummer at his
yodeling farm.
Dani has PAUSED. She hadn’t heard this before.
DANI
...Oh yeah?
Dani turns to Christian, who now looks semi-panicked.
CHRISTIAN
I mean, yeah, we were thinking
about maybe - we were talking
about it.
DANI
For when?
Dani feigns casualness as she looks inquiringly to the guys.
JOSH MARK
...Mid June to late July? In two weeks.
CHRISTIAN
I mean, if we even go. I probably
won’t. We were just talking about
it.
Mark, Josh and Pelle stand awkwardly, confused. Christian
clearly hasn’t been honest with Dani.
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Scene 4 - A Sudden Departure and an Unexpected Offer
Dani sits in the back seat of a Lyft car. Christian sits in
the front passenger seat.
Dani’s eyes are BUSY with nagging, paranoid thoughts.
Christian, very tense, turns to look back at Dani. He forces
a casual “hey” smile. Ambivalent, she “smiles” back.
16 INT. DANI’S APARTMENT - NIGHT 16
The door opens. Christian and Dani enter. Christian goes to
his laptop and turns it on. Dani stays by the door, still
preoccupied. Christian looks to her.
CHRISTIAN
Are you okay?
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Dani looks at him, hesitant to start a fight. Christian gives
her an impatient look: “Yes? No?”
DANI
I mean - yeah. I’m okay. That was
just...very weird.
CHRISTIAN
(playing dumb)
What was?
Dani looks at him: “Seriously?” Christian widens his eyes:
“What was weird?”
DANI
The...Sweden! I had no idea.
CHRISTIAN
Well - what do you mean? I told you
I wanted to go.
DANI
Okay, fine, but I didn’t know you
were going.
CHRISTIAN
Well, I just decided today. I
wasn’t keeping it from you.
DANI
You already have a ticket!
Beat. Christian now looks cornered.
CHRISTIAN
(shrugs)
I’m sorry.
Christian looks extremely defensive. He has LOCKED DOWN. Dani
sees this, gathers herself, and tries to explain:
DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
It’s just -- imagine if we
were at a party and someone
asks "what are you doing this
summer," and my friends say:
"oh, we’re all going to (correcting)
Sweden. A month and a half.
China for three months, we’re
leaving in two weeks,” and
imagine that was the first
you’d ever heard of it!
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Okay: I told you I wanted to go to
Sweden.
DANI
You told me it would be “cool to
go.”
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
Yeah! And then I got the
opportunity to go and I I have no problem with you
decided to do it. going! I just wish you'd
think to tell me!
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CHRISTIAN
Well, I just apologized, Dani.
DANI
You didn't apologize, you said -
(shrugs)
- "sorry." Which sounds more like
"too bad."
Beat. Christian’s eyes are now very cold.
CHRISTIAN
Maybe I should just go home.
DANI
...I’m just trying to understand.
CHRISTIAN
And I tried apologizing.
DANI
I don't need an apology. I just
wanna talk about it.
Pause.
CHRISTIAN
I think I should just probably go
home.
Dani looks helpless.
DANI
I'm not trying to attack you.
CHRISTIAN
Well, it feels like that.
DANI
Well...I’m sorry! I am sorry. I
just got confused.
Christian’s eyes, looking down, haven’t begun to thaw. Dani,
now desperate to reverse the mood, sits on the couch. She
beckons him.
DANI (CONT’D)
Come on: Sit with me. I'm sorry. That
just felt weird, that's all. I think
going to Sweden could be really great
for you. That sounds amazing. Are you
going for your thesis?
CHRISTIAN
(quietly)
I don’t know what my thesis is.
DANI
(brightly)
I know! It could be inspiring!
Right?
CHRISTIAN
(still looking down)
...I think I’m just gonna leave.
Dani’s eyes start to well intensely with TEARS.
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DANI
Please. I'm sorry. I didn't mean to
overreact. Please.
Christian SOFTENS when he sees that she’s crying. Still
distant, he sits with her.
CHRISTIAN
Okay - shhh. It’s okay. I’m sorry,
too. All right?
DANI
I get paranoid. I'm sorry. I'm
going through all this stuff and
I've been dealing with all this
panic and I just - overreacted.
I'm not trying to put pressure or
accuse you of anything. I just got
crazy for a second. I didn't mean
to project.
Christian strokes her hair.
CHRISTIAN
It’s okay. I’m sorry, too. It’s
okay.
Beat. Christian is wrestling with something, and then:
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
(uncertainly)
I was gonna ask you to come with
me.
Pause. Dani looks at him. He looks very tense.
DANI
What do you mean?
CHRISTIAN
...What I just said.
DANI
To Sweden?
Christian nods a stiff “yes.”
DANI (CONT’D)
You don’t want me to.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
I just asked you. After I broke down crying!
CHRISTIAN
Well...you ruined the surprise.
Dani searches Christian’s eyes. They aren’t especially
warm.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
I wanted it to be romantic.
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Scene 5 - Unexpected Arrival
Mark & Josh’s apartment is essentially a stoner’s den
crossed with a serious anthropologist’s home. Ironic posters
(a portrait of Ronald Reagan, etc.) are countered by posters
of James George Frazer and Claude Lévi-Strauss. There are
stacks of books in every corner.
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Christian, Mark, Pelle and Josh sit in the living room, smoking
from a bong. Josh holds a book by Johannes Bureus (titled
Adalruna) and Pelle is drawing in his notepad.
JOSH
Are the Swedes sensitive about
their history of Nazi
collaboration?
PELLE JOSH (CONT'D)
Are you sensitive about
Hiroshima? I am, yes.
Or the trail of tears? Yep.
Or slavery? Uhhh - what do you think?
Christian looks extremely preoccupied. His foot pumps
involuntarily. He receives a TEXT.
CHRISTIAN
(anxiously)
Hey guys, it’s Dani - she’s coming
up.
MARK JOSH
...Okay. (re: weed and bong)
Should we clear all this?
CHRISTIAN
No no, it doesn’t matter. But uh -
listen...
Christian goes to buzz her in.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
...just so you guys know: she’s not
gonna actually come, but I invited
her on the trip. Just to not make it
weird.
A moment of silence. Pelle sits especially frozen.
MARK
You invited her?
CHRISTIAN
Yeah, but she’s not coming.
JOSH
She doesn’t want to?
CHRISTIAN
(measuredly)
No: I "invited" her and she
"accepted," but she's not gonna
actually come.
Mark and Josh just stare at him.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
You guys know what she’s dealing
with!
MARK JOSH
No, we know. I just didn’t
realize. It’s totally fine if Yeah, dude, nobody minds.
she joins.
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A KNOCK at the door. Christian goes to answer it, but before
he does, he reasserts:
CHRISTIAN
Okay, so just: you guys told me to
invite her and you know that she’s
coming. Agreed?
They don’t respond. Christian now OPENS the door to DANI. She
enters with an almost apologetic smile on her face.
DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
Hey. Hi baby.
(to the room) JOSH/MARK/PELLE
Hey guys! Hey!
DANI
How’s it going?
MARK
Just chillin’.
DANI
Nice.
A brief, awkward pause.
JOSH
So, Sweden...!
DANI
Yeah!
PELLE
You’re coming, right?
DANI
I think so...! If it’s not completely
destroying your guys’ male bonding
plans.
MARK/JOSH/PELLE CHRISTIAN
Nope. / Not at all. Oh, shut the fuck up.
Dani smiles bashfully. Mark abruptly addresses Christian:
MARK
Hey man, can I get you to look at
that paragraph real quick?
CHRISTIAN
(confused pause)
Sure. Yeah. Okay.
(to Dani)
Right back.
Christian kisses Dani, and leaves the room with Mark. Dani
looks to the ROOM. Josh has returned to his book. Pelle,
alone on the couch, warmly gestures for Dani to join him. She
obliges.
DANI PELLE
Hey Pelle. Hi Dani.
She notices that Pelle has been composing a DRAWING in his
notepad. It’s a drawing of the room.
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DANI
Ooh, that’s a beautiful drawing.
PELLE
Oh, thank you! I’m trying to be a
naturalist.
Pelle closes the drawing pad. Gives Dani his full attention.
DANI
How’ve you been?
PELLE
Pretty good! Survived finals. You?
DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
Uh, well - didn’t quite
finish! But they’re giving me (realizing)
a break this year... Oh, right. God. Of course.
Dani makes an embarrassed “bleh” face.
DANI
How did you like the Anthropology
department?
PELLE
It’s good! I just can’t seem to choose
if I hate academia or not. Unlike this
one.
(”this one” being Josh)
You’re doing psychiatry?
DANI
Psychology. Yeah. That’s how you
know I’m nuts.
PELLE
Also that funny look in your eye.
Dani LAUGHS, a bit unnaturally. An awkward moment.
PELLE (CONT’D)
So! You’re coming to Hälsingland!
DANI
Yeah! I can’t wait. Christian says
you’ve got a special thing in the
woods planned?
PELLE
Oh yes - a sort of crazy, nine-day
festival we’re doing...
DANI
Do you do that every midsummer?
PELLE
Uh - well...this specific one
happens only once every ninety
years. So it’ll be a first and a
last for everybody.
Pelle raises his eyebrows, mock-menacing.
DANI
...Christian says you’re from a
really small community?
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PELLE
Oh yes - tiny. Very sort of...
(”what’s the word?”)
Incestuous? Incestual?
DANI
Depends on which of those you mean.
PELLE
Oh - ha! No: we’re just very
secluded...
Pelle pulls up a PHOTO on his phone. Shows it to Dani. It
features a lush, impossibly green field. Young men and women
stand about - all dressed like hippies in white.
DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
Oh wow! Yeah...we do our own thing.
DANI
Looks like a Swedish hippie
renaissance fair.
(noticing another photo)
Who’s this one?
Dani is pointing out a photo of a YOUNG WOMAN (20s) in an
impressive flower dress. (We will later discover her to be
Ulla.)
PELLE
Ooh - that’s last year’s May
Queen!
DANI
Beautiful.
A thoughtful pause before he asserts:
PELLE
You know, I think it’s actually
very good you’re coming.
DANI
(cheekily)
Oh yeah? For who?
PELLE
For you! And for my family. I think
you’ll be very...
Pelle weaves his fingers together, signifying a tight-knit
connection. Dani smiles. Pelle PAUSES again, and his tone now
CHANGES. He leans forward, sensitively:
PELLE (CONT’D)
You know...I never had the chance
to tell you, but I was really so
very sorry to hear about - your
loss...
DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
Oh...! ...and what happened.
I can’t even fathom. I mean,
I lost my parents too, so I
have some idea, but...
Dani looks cornered. TEARS have welled up in her eyes.
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PELLE (CONT’D)
Oh, no. Sorry to bring it up!
DANI
No, I mean - thank you. I just...
I'm sorry.
(stands up suddenly)
I'll be right back. Bathroom. Thank
you.
Dani rushes off. Pelle watches her with blank eyes.
Dani, stifling tears, enters the BATHROOM.
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Scene 6 - Driving Through Sweden
Dani has entered an airplane’s lavatory, stifling an oncoming
deluge. After shutting the door behind her, she BREAKS DOWN
in a fit of violent SOBS.
19 INT. AIRPLANE (IN FLIGHT) - MINUTES LATER 19
We are WIDE, looking down the length of the plane. We track
forward, drifting over the heads of passengers.
In the b.g., Dani exits the lavatory and returns to her seat.
Christian is seated beside her at the window. We have arrived
at a PROFILE CU of them (the window in the b.g.).
Christian takes Dani’s hand and smiles at her. It’s clear
she’s been crying, but she hides it behind a determinedly
casual “all is well” expression.
Christian goes along with the pretending, and looks out the
WINDOW. We have begun a slow ZOOM past them, toward the
window. The window soon FILLS the frame. We are flying over
beautiful terrain. We have entered SWEDEN. The captain
announces this in Swedish over the intercom.
20 *OMITTED* 20
21 INT. RENTAL MINIVAN (MOVING) - DAY 21
Our group, now in a rental minivan, drives through Stockholm
traffic. Pelle is at the wheel. Mark sits passenger, holding
a film theory book. In the back: Dani, Christian and Josh
(who reads the Poetic Edda).
They pass a group of BEAUTIFUL BLONDE WOMEN.
MARK
(to Christian)
Holy God, the women here...!
Christian, aware of Dani, gives a self-conscious half-nod.
Dani happily pretends to ignore this.
MARK (CONT’D)
What is it that makes them hotter?
JOSH
The Vikings grabbed all the best
babes from other countries and
dragged them over.
They have now pulled onto the FREEWAY - leaving Stockholm.
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DANI
How far are we driving?
PELLE
Four hours, about.
MARK
(exasperated)
Oh my God.
21A INT. FREEWAY RENTAL MINIVAN (MOVING) - LATER - DAY 21A
Dani’s phone VIBRATES, waking her up. She checks it...
DANI’S PHONE: A friend has just posted on her Facebook page
“Happy early birthday! Hope tomorrow is the best one yet!”
Dani doesn’t react. She looks to the side to notice a book on
Josh’s lap. The Secret Nazi Language of the Uthark. Its cover
is a runic pattern.
DANI
Why are you reading that?
JOSH
(realizing what she’s
talking about)
Oh! Ha. Ask Pelle.
PELLE
(accepting the cue)
We’re taught the runic alphabet in
my village. Josh just carries that
around to annoy me.
DANI
(to Josh)
What are you doing your thesis on,
again?
JOSH
Uhhhh - well! My focus is actually on
European midsummer traditions. Which
was basically the impetus behind this
whole trip. I’m doing Germany and
England after this.
DANI
(to Christian)
That’s similar to what you’re thinking
of doing - right? For your thesis?
CHRISTIAN
(tensely)
Well, I don’t know quite what I’m
doing. (As you know.) But I’m thinking
about rooting it in something
Scandinavian.
DANI
See that, Pelle? You’ve managed to
brainwash all your friends.
PELLE
Josh was already brainwashed when I
found him.
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21A CONTINUED: 21A
JOSH
(re: Pelle’s
acknowledgement)
Thank you.
DISSOLVE TO:
22 *OMITTED* 22
23 *OMITTED* 23
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Scene 7 - A Midsummer Night's Trip
Pelle drives under an anti-immigration BANNER (in Swedish)
before passing a sign announcing that they have arrived in
Hälsingland.
PELLE
Entering Hälsingland!
25 EXT. MEADOW - CONTINUOUS 25
The minivan idles up to a LARGE GRASSY MEADOW. It’s lush,
impossibly green, magical. About twenty YOUNG PEOPLE (teens
to twenties) lounge about. Tents and camping equipment
abound. A few of the women are dressed in traditional white
dresses and don floral garland crowns. A couple of the men
look like 19th century farmers, although most are dressed in
modern clothes.
The minivan parks at the head of the field. Our group
emerges, yawning and stretching. Dani is mesmerized. Pelle
WAVES to a group of young people picnicking on the grass.
They clearly know each other well.
GIRLS
Pelle!!
Pelle gestures for our group to follow him as he approaches
the picnickers. Pelle explains as they walk:
PELLE
These are all younger people from
my village. Everyone’s returning
from their trips outside.
Pelle arrives at the group and receives a flood of hugs.
Everyone introduces themselves.
Then, across the field, a merry Blonde Guy (25) calls out to
Pelle. This is INGEMAR.
INGEMAR
(in Swedish)
Holy shit! Pelle!!
Pelle turns to Ingemar. His face LIGHTS UP, and he runs over
to him. Dani, Christian, Mark and Josh follow.
INGEMAR (CONT’D)
Glad Heliga Johannes Döparens dag!
Pelle laughs. They hug.
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25 CONTINUED: 25
INGEMAR (CONT’D)
Fan vad spinkig du är! Vart har
resten av dig tagit vägen?
PELLE INGEMAR (CONT'D)
Ser ut som att du fått det.. Va? Tycker du att jag blivit
fet?
PELLE
Here: English. These are my great
friends. Josh, Christian, Mark,
Dani: meet my brother Ingemar. Best
friend since we were babies.
INGEMAR
(recounting)
Josh, Christian, Mark...Dani?
(confirmed)
Awesome! And say hello to my
friends, Simon and Connie from
London.
He gestures to an attractive British couple, CONNIE (24,
skinny) and SIMON (26, spectacled, tattooed).
INGEMAR (CONT’D)
Simon and Connie, this is Pelle
and...all the names I just learned
two seconds back.
SIMON CONNIE
Hey. Hello.
INGEMAR
Perfect timing, by the way:
Ingemar pulls out a bag of MAGIC MUSHROOMS. Hands them to
Pelle.
INGEMAR (CONT’D)
We just took these five minutes
back. Haven’t even started coming up
yet.
MARK
(overjoyed)
Ohhh shit.
Mark grabs the bag from Pelle and studies the contents.
PELLE MARK (CONT'D)
(to the group)
Do you guys wanna take it
now? Or should we settle in
first? Fuck it. Let’s just take ‘em.
DANI
(to Christian)
I think I might need to find my
footing first.
CHRISTIAN
Yeah. Of course.
(quietly)
And you know you don’t need to take
them. If you’re feeling unsure.
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DANI
No, I just need to get settled.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
Okay. Well. I’ll wait for
you. No - go ahead!
CHRISTIAN
No, I’ll wait. We’ll come up
together.
Josh and Mark and Pelle have pulled their mushrooms from the
bag. They look to Christian, ready to go.
PELLE
Ready?
CHRISTIAN
I’m waiting for Dani. You guys go
on.
MARK
Dude. We can’t come up at different
times. They’ll be totally separate
trips.
CHRISTIAN
Then you can wait for us.
Mark looks frustrated - angry even.
DANI
You know what? That’s okay. I’m
ready.
CHRISTIAN
Baby. Don’t feel rushed.
DANI
I don’t. I’m ready.
MARK DANI (CONT'D)
(false concern) (bluntly)
You sure? Yeah, Mark, thanks.
INGEMAR
They made mushroom tea if you
prefer against the taste.
DANI
(considers)
Okay. Yeah. I’ll have that. Thank
you - Ingmar?
Ingemar smiles confirmation and goes to fetch her a mug of
tea.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
Don’t let Mark pressure you. He’s not. It’ll get too
Of all people. complicated otherwise. It’s
fine.
Ingemar hands Dani her TEA.
PELLE
(to Dani)
Ready?
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Dani, now holding the tea, nods yes.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Okay. Here we go. Think happy
thoughts!
They eat their shrooms. Dani hesitates before SIPPING the tea.
CHRISTIAN
You okay?
DANI
Yeah. It’s good. I’m excited.
CHRISTIAN
(still concerned)
Cool. Me too.
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Scene 8 - Dani's Discomfort
Dani sits on the grass with Christian and Pelle. Mark is off
to the side, stabbing at an ANT COLONY with a stick. Josh
paces nearby. His stomach TURNS audibly.
JOSH
Uggghhh, I really don’t feel good.
Josh hunches over to RETCH.
MARK
Don’t puke, dude. Keep it down.
CHRISTIAN
(to Dani)
How are you feeling?
DANI
A little like I have food
poisoning.
PELLE CHRISTIAN
Technically you do. It’ll go
away soon. And you can throw it up if
you need to.
25B EXT. MEADOW BUSH 25B
JUMP CUT to Dani VOMITING into a bush. Christian stands near
her.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
That’s good, baby. It’s okay. Throw
it up.
Dani rises to take a breath.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Does that feel better?
PELLE
Don’t worry - you had it down long
enough. You’re still gonna trip.
25C EXT. LARGE GRASSY MEADOW - MINUTES LATER 25C
The group sits on the grass together. The sun is still
shining.
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CHRISTIAN
What time is it?
PELLE
Nine PM.
MARK
(suddenly alarmed)
What do you mean?!
PELLE
What do you mean?
MARK
That doesn’t feel right.
PELLE MARK (CONT'D)
Why? It’s the midnight sun. It doesn’t feel like nine. I
don’t like that! It feels
wrong.
A YOUNG MAN approaches.
CHRISTIAN
Oh fuck. It’s a new person.
MARK PELLE
What? I don’t want new
people. No - new people are good!
A happy Young Man walks past. This is VALENTIN.
VALENTIN
Hey hey!
The group mumbles hello.
MARK
I wanna lay down.
Mark lies down.
MARK (CONT’D)
Oh my God. Lay down. Guys. It’s so
nice.
Everyone lies down. Except for Josh and Dani. For the rest
of the scene, our focus is on DANI - even as everyone else
speaks.
MARK (CONT’D)
Lie down, Josh.
Josh doesn’t. Stubborn.
PELLE
Can you feel the energy come up
from the earth?
(then, noticing)
And look: the trees, too - they’re
breathing!
Dani looks up. The trees do seem to be breathing - visibly
swelling and deflating with psychedelic life. They LOOM
IMPOSINGLY over Dani. They GROAN in the wind, their branches
leaning (almost reaching) down.
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Pelle, marveling at his surroundings, continues:
PELLE (CONT’D)
Nature just knows instinctually
how to stay in harmony! Everything
mechanically doing its part.
MARK
(emotional)
You guys are my family.
The word “family” HITS Dani.
MARK (CONT’D)
I really mean that. You’re like my
real actual Family.
Dani RISES to her knees, suddenly overwhelmed. Christian
looks to her. She looks to him. He SMILES, but there’s
something false about it.
Dani looks SCARED now. This scares Christian.
CHRISTIAN
Dani? Don’t look like that.
Dani STANDS, panic mounting. Her eyes look crazed.
DANI
I’m sorry. I’m gonna walk.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
I can walk, too. No no. Sorry. I’m gonna...
Dani starts to walk off, a terrible feeling rising in her.
JOSH MARK
Is she mad at us? I don’t like how she did
that.
Dani continues to walk. She’s starting to think very bad
thoughts.
DANI
(to herself)
No, that’s not good. No. No.
She then stumbles onto a group of mirthful YOUTHS - all
wearing flower garlands. They sit in a circle as a YOUNG
WOMAN (20s) plays guitar and sings Så Lunka Vi Så Småningom
in a silly voice (to the laughter of the others). They all
suddenly see Dani, the guitarist stops playing, and
then...they all BURST OUT LAUGHING.
Dani turns stiffly away, tears welling.
DANI (CONT’D)
No, no, no, no...
Dani tensely speed-walks away, looking down at the ground.
Her surroundings are THROBBING visibly (and more intensely
than before).
INGEMAR calls out to Dani.
INGEMAR
Hey! Dani!
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Dani freezes. Terrified, she looks up in his direction. He
waves her over. He’s standing with a few youths at a picnic
table. Behind them, Connie is tending to Simon, who looks
ill.
Dani warily approaches.
INGEMAR (CONT’D)
How are you feeling? Everyone: this
is Pelle’s friend, Dani.
Everyone says hi.
DANI
They were laughing at me over
there.
INGEMAR
What? No, I’m sure they weren’t.
They probably just wanted you to
laugh with them.
But Ingemar’s face was MUTATING as he said that.
DANI
(terrified, forcing a
smile)
Okay. Sorry. Never mind. Thank you.
Dani turns around and walks stiffly off.
DANI (CONT’D)
(trying to turn it around)
It’s okay. It’s not that. You’re
okay. It’s drugs.
She continues toward a sturdy wooden OUTHOUSE. She hastily
enters and SHUTS the door.
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Scene 9 - Eyes of the Beast
The interior of the outhouse is pitch-dark. We hear Dani
fumbling for a box of MATCHES. After rummaging, she STRIKES
one match, and for the moment of the SPARK, we vaguely see
TERRI (Dani’s sister, duct tape over her mouth) in the dark
behind Dani. When the light settles, that image disappears.
The outhouse, now illuminated by candle-light, is very clean
and cramped. Dani stands here for a moment.
DANI
This is a coffin.
(immediately reprimanding
herself)
Hey! No it’s not.
Dani sees a MIRROR on the wall. She looks at it. Hard.
DANI (CONT’D)
Fuck you. Stop it.
Suddenly her skin seems to take on a translucent quality. Her
veins become faintly visible. Beneath her cheeks, it looks
like organic gears are turning.
DANI SQUEEZES HER EYES SHUT. She takes a moment, trying to
will that vision away.
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DANI (CONT’D)
Don’t look in the mirror. It’s not
your face.
(saying that again, under
scrutiny)
“It’s not your face.”
After a long moment, Dani OPENS her eyes again. When they
open, TEN ADDITIONAL EYES open simultaneously - all over her
face. Like spider eyes.
Dani SCREAMS and FLEES the outhouse...
27 EXT. OUTHOUSE - CONTINUOUS 27
Dani runs frantically across the field, desperately wiping
off her face (as if to wipe off the extra eyes). We CHASE
AFTER HER before CUTTING TO:
28 EXT. FIELD - SAME TIME 28
Christian, Josh, Mark and Pelle are still lying in the same
spot. They’ve hit the peak of their trip. Twilight is coming.
In the b.g., a group has finished setting up LARGE SPEAKERS.
CHRISTIAN
Where did she go?
MARK JOSH
It’s okay. (looking at his hands)
Why the fuck do we have
fingerprints?
Christian STANDS, panic starting to build.
CHRISTIAN
Dani’s gone. We need to find Dani.
JOSH MARK
I don’t feel like standing. Yeah - I don’t wanna move.
CHRISTIAN
Hey! Dani’s our friend!
MARK
She isn’t all of our friend.
CHRISTIAN MARK (CONT'D)
What? Yes she is. That’s not
nice! Why aren’t you ever (scared by this)
What? I am nice.
nice?! (tearing up)
You’re being mean! I’m not being mean!
Droning techno begins to THROB from the speakers in the b.g.
With every bass punch, the surrounding environment THUMPS
visibly.
CHRISTIAN
Dani’s our friend. And she’s sad.
MARK
But that makes me sad!
(suddenly angry)
And she’s NOT our friend! She’s
barely YOUR friend!
(MORE)
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MARK (CONT'D)
You only invited her because you’re
too scared to be honest with her!
Christian pauses, FURIOUS, and then:
CHRISTIAN
Her family is dead, Mark!
MARK CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
(suddenly terrified)
Why are you saying that? Because they are! They’re
dead!
MARK JOSH
Why??? (insistent)
HEY! NO! We need to connect
back to the good things! This
is getting bad! Everything’s
alive right now.
CHRISTIAN MARK
But that’s just so it can die (getting sucked into
later. darkness)
Oh God...!
PELLE
But then it gets reborn! Death is
just shit fertilizing crops.
Everything gets recycled and made
new again.
Silence. Everyone looks at Pelle, catching up to what he just
said. Christian STOMPS OFF.
MARK
Wait! Christian! We need to stay
together!
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Scene 10 - The Ant-Infested Woods
Dani paces in the woods. Muffled techno drones in the
distance.
DANI
Hello?!... HELLO??!!
(redirecting her thoughts)
It’s almost your birthday. Fuck.
What time is it?
(then, PAUSES)
You were almost born... You’re a
baby.
This gets to Dani. She now looks around the woods, fearfully.
Like a lost child.
DANI (CONT’D)
MOMMY?!... DADDY?!...
(silently to herself)
Mommy daddy mommy daddy...
(absolutely panicked now)
CHRISTIAN?!
No answer.
DANI (CONT’D)
No...no.... You’re alone.
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Then it HITS Dani. Her eyes well intensely with tears. This
idea is now horribly significant.
DANI (CONT’D)
(a revelation)
You’re alone.
Dani sees a DEAD RABBIT. Its innards are splayed.
Dani warily approaches. Magnetized but repulsed. As she nears,
the FEAR rises in her. She gets close enough to finally see...
The rabbit is being devoured by ANTS.
Dani looks mortified, but her eyes are glued. She LEANS IN to
look closer, but then -- she sees ANTS on her arm. (Whether
they’re there or not is unclear.)
Dani SCREAMS. She violently SLAPS at her arm. She then swipes
at her other arm, and starts slapping at her NECK and FACE,
as if she were engulfed in ants. (She’s not.)
Dani looks down. The earth seems to now be a PULSATING CARPET
OF ANTS.
Dani SCREAMS and RUNS for her life. As she sprints:
CHRISTIAN (O.S.)
Dani!
Dani FREEZES, eyes crazed.
DANI CHRISTIAN (O.S.) (CONT'D)
...Christian?! Dani!!
Dani searches desperately for his voice. She FINDS him
standing at a CLEARING. She runs for him, crying.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Where the hell did you go?!
They EMBRACE. She hugs him. SQUEEZES him.
DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
I got lost. Let’s go back to the group.
DANI
(still squeezing)
Christian. Nothing means anything.
CHRISTIAN
What?
DANI
(looking at him)
Nothing means anything! We’re just
alone.
(tearing up)
And I felt this presence - like God
but not God - and it was showing me
this and it was laughing at me.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
You heard laughing? I felt it laughing! I figured
it out, that nothing means
anything and we’re all alone,
and it was getting pleasure
from that.
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Christian is getting SCARED.
CHRISTIAN
Okay, just - calm down--
DANI
Oh my God what the fuck is that?!
Dani is now pointing to a BIG TREE in the BG. SEVERAL BOAR
CARCASSES HANG FROM ITS BRANCHES. Christian sees it, but
instantly turns away - denying it.
CHRISTIAN
(firmly)
No.
He takes Dani’s ARM -
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Fuck. Stop it. That wasn’t real. We’re
going back to the friends. Fuck.
- and starts leading her away.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
You’re having a bad trip, and you’re
thinking you’re alone because you
went off and you made yourself
alone. You just got scared.
He’s now PULLING Dani, aggressively.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
(not even looking at her)
You have me. Everything’s connected.
We’re all one. Those are the good
things you’re supposed to think
about. We’re all unified. Fuck.
Christian has been leading her out of the woods. They emerge
onto the FIELD, where the droning techno is now very present
(and making the visible surroundings THROB to its beat).
We track alongside Dani and Christian as they walk uneasily
through the grass - past groups of happy, tripping strangers.
Christian’s eyes are glued tensely to the ground, combating
dark thoughts. Dani looks less frightened now than
disconnected.
They arrive at Josh, Mark and Pelle, who are now accompanied
by CONNIE, SIMON, INGEMAR and the BLONDE SWEDISH GUITARIST
(20s), who is still holding her guitar.
BLONDE SWEDISH GUITARIST
Hej hej!
MARK PELLE
Where were you? How are you, Dani?
CHRISTIAN
(insistent)
We’re fine. She’s fine. Just took a
little walk.
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JOSH
(excitedly)
Did you see the trees with the dead
boars hanging?!
DANI
(to Pelle)
I wanna sleep. How can I sleep?
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Scene 11 - Arrival at the Hårga Farmstead
CLOSE-UP OF DANI’S SLEEPING FACE.
In the distance: a faint, barely discernible melody. It
sounds like a flute.
A HAND reaches into frame to nudge Dani. She stirs awake.
CHRISTIAN (O.C.)
It’s time to get up.
DANI
...how long was I asleep?
Dani sits up. It’s still BRIGHT outside. The visual
surroundings are no longer morphing. Mark and Pelle and Josh
are standing. Christian is crouched beside her.
DANI (CONT’D)
Did it get dark at all?
PELLE
For a couple hours. Not completely.
Then something occurs to Dani:
DANI
Is it tomorrow?
CHRISTIAN
I mean...from yesterday’s
perspective.
Dani looks at Christian, whose expression is blank. She
SINKS with quiet disappointment. (He forgot her birthday.)
Christian helps Dani up. She wobbles.
DANI
Where are we going?
PELLE
Where we came for.
30 EXT. WOODS - DAY 30
Everyone from the meadow CRUNCHES through the woods. Our
group is at the end of the queue (carrying their bags). As
they walk, the MELODY is growing clearer and louder. It’s a
hypnotic tune.
The group’s footing is unsteady. Dani, especially, keeps
stumbling over her own feet. She grips Christian’s wrist.
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MARK
(starting to take large,
paranoid steps)
Does Sweden have ticks?
CHRISTIAN
Sweden has a tick problem.
MARK
What? No they don’t. Do they
really?
PELLE
It actually is a big problem. Last
summer a record number of people
got tick-borne encephalitis.
MARK JOSH
What the fuck? Are you (teasing)
serious? Both my grandparents died
from ticks. Hit the floor
screaming.
Dani notices a few disparate FLOWERS sprouting up from the
ground. As she walks, the flowers continue to accumulate.
Soon she’s walking down a controlled, narrow TRAIL of wild
yellow flowers - all leading toward a CLEARING.
MARK (O.S.)
Okay, well, I actually have an
uncle with Lyme and believe me:
it’s not worth the pleasant picnic
in the countryside.
The group finally arrives at the clearing. It opens to
another FIELD, beyond which is a SMALL VILLAGE...
31 EXT. HÅRGA FARMSTEAD - CONTINUOUS 31
It is a vast Hälsingegård (a farm). About a HUNDRED PEOPLE
stand on the grass, waiting. They are dressed like farmers
from a Swedish fairy tale. They appear to be a WELCOMING
COMMITTEE. The melody, we now see, is being played by three
floutists. A bundle of SPEAKERS (aimed upwards) amplifies
this.
At the center of the farm is one particularly LARGE building
in the shape of a barn; this is the MAIN HOUSE. Surrounding
this are several houses, a horse stable, a temple, and
different gardens. The windows and doorways are all adorned
in ST. JOHN’S WORT (flowers with bright yellow petals and
golden stamens). Beyond the farmstead are fields of CROPS.
Most of the arriving crowd is embraced ecstatically by the
welcoming committee. They hug and kiss and squeal with
excitement. It appears to be something of a REUNION. Pelle,
in particular, is bombarded with affection. (Many of the
arriving youths have ornamented robes/costumes thrown over
them by the older people.)
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JOSH
(mesmerized)
This is the place?
PELLE
(slightly tongue-in-cheek)
The tranquil and majestic Hårga.
Josh, Mark, Christian and Dani stand awkwardly through this.
Some children walk up to them, to hand them wild strawberries
on sticks. Others step up to take their bags. Josh,
meanwhile, is manically taking photos with his smartphone.
CHRISTIAN
(to Pelle)
You know all these people?
PELLE
These are my family!
MARK (O.S.)
You know, dude, if you’d warned me
that this place was lousy with
ticks, I could’ve at least brought
tweezers and like a spray.
In the distance is a towering MAYPOLE. Immense in height and
width, it is entangled in lush green shrubbery and marked by
a wealth of symbols. At the top of the pole is a TRIANGLE,
beneath which hang two RINGS.
While some of the welcoming committee take bags from our
group, Pelle brings a beautiful young woman over. This is
DAGNY (25). She wears a white dress with intricate embroidery
(featuring distinct Pagan runes).
PELLE
Dagny - det här är Dani, Christian,
Josh, Mark.
(in English, to the guys)
This is my sister Dagny. Born on
the same exact week as me.
DAGNY
Välkommen till Hårga!
DANI JOSH/CHRISTIAN
(attempting Swedish)
Tack! Thank you!
Dagny smiles and walks off.
An older man, ODD (50s), approaches. He is wearing a dress.
Pelle lights up at the sight of him.
PELLE ODD
Fader Odd! Lille Pelle!
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They embrace. There is a moment where they rest their
foreheads together. (Note: throughout the film, the Hårgas
will communicate little things through subtly modulated
expressions and gestures. These are their AFFECTS, a language
known only to them.)
ODD (CONT’D)
Hur är det på pilgrimsfärden?
PELLE
Underbart, Fantastiskt.
(in English)
These are my friends - Christian,
Mark, Josh, Dani...
Odd shakes their hands as Pelle introduces them.
ODD
Hello, hello...yes, hello, welcome.
(to Dani)
Welcome home!
He HUGS Dani.
DANI
(amused, but slightly
weirded out)
Thank you.
ODD
We are very happy to have you!
Pelle has an immaculate sense for
people.
Pelle smiles.
DANI
I love what you’re wearing.
ODD
Oh - my frock? Quite girly, no? Ha!
(explains)
We do this as a tribute: In respect
of Ymir and because of nature’s,
em...
(blushes at bad English)
hermaphrodite?...qualities...?
JOSH
Oh wow, that’s like the cult of
Aphroditus.
(then, remembering)
I think the sakhis saints do the
same thing, too - in Brajbhoomi?
If Odd is annoyed, he hides it well. He shines a tight-lipped
SMILE at Josh.
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ODD
So! We’re your hosts, yes?! So
whatever you need, you just say so
and we will accommodate! Today is
all festivities, yet tomorrow the
official ceremonies begin, and you
are Welcome-Welcome-Welcome. So
enjoy!
They all say thanks and Odd walks happily away.
MARK
Nice guy.
The music suddenly gets LOUDER. Percussion is introduced, and
the music swells to become a regal melody.
Everyone’s attention moves to TEN GIRLS & BOYS (different
ages - from 7 to 13), all dressed in identical white dresses
and suits. They hold FLORAL GARLAND CROWNS (made of mugwort
and vervain) and sprigs of LARKSPUR. They are walking single-
file towards a PLATFORM...
Sitting on the platform are TEN OLD MEN AND WOMEN (60s to
early 70s). These are the ELDERS. They wear severe or neutral
expressions, and are dressed in finely embroidered linen.
The girls and boys march onto the platform. They each stop to
the left of one of the seated elders. Upon a cue, they
simultaneously lay the crowns onto the elders’ heads. (Two of
the elders receive slightly larger crowns.) They then hand
the elders the larkspur sprigs. After this, the girls return
bashfully to the crowd.
One of the elders - a sturdy older woman (60s) - rises to
address the crowd. The music drops out. She is beautiful,
composed, elegant. This is SIV, the spokeswoman.
SIV
Glad midsommar allihopa!
As she speaks, several TEENS - all wearing outfits to
distinguish them as waiters - pass out shot glasses of
AQUAVIT.
SIV (CONT’D)
Välkomna till bords. Vi har den
värsta värmeböljan i mannaminne,
vilket är passande. Som ni vet så
är det här festen vi förberett oss
för i 90 år.
She notices the non-Swedish speakers, who are just arriving
at the back of the crowd. They receive shot glasses.
SIV (CONT’D)
Forgive me - I’m excluding the ones
who aren’t of Swedish tongue!
Welcome to Hårga, and happy
midsummer!
(MORE)
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SIV (CONT’D)
I believe it is the hottest and
brightest that we’ve had in at
least a decade, and this is our
biggest party in almost a century!
So - wow, yes?
JOSH/DANI/CHRISTIAN/CONNIE
(as if solicited)
Yeah. Wow.
Siv smiles, and proceeds to wrap it up.
SIV
All right, my fellow merrymakers.
Without any further blathering -
let’s raise our glasses -
Everyone raises their aquavit.
SIV (CONT’D)
- and let our Nine-Day Feast
commence!
(announcing)
Skål!
EVERYONE
Skål!!
The crowd drinks. Everyone CHEERS. Including our group. The
MUSIC begins again.
On one side of the platform: A young GIRL, also wearing an
embroidered white dress, walks up with a JUNIPER BOUGH in
each hand. She is accompanied by a TEENAGE BOY, who holds two
FLAMING TORCHES. Meanwhile, two of the ELDERS (72) have risen
from their seats. These are YLVA and DAN. They are the elders
with the larger crowns. They move off the stage.
Siv now speaks in English, presumably for our group’s benefit.
(As she does this, the young girl and teen boy hand the elderly
men a juniper bough and flaming stick.)
SIV
And now, in keeping with tradition:
Ylva and Dan will make three trips.
If they return with the flame
intact, our vintage will be abundant
this year! Alternately, if it burns
out - that will be an omen of bad
luck and we will know to prepare.
Josh turns to Pelle.
JOSH
What does “bad luck” mean?
PELLE
Usually that the cattle will get
sick.
Siv yells to the air:
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SIV
Tillbaka till döden, andar!
JOSH
(to Pelle)
What did she just say?
PELLE
Told any lingering spirits to go
back to the dead.
The two large-crowned elders, now BLINDFOLDED, begin to run
around the Main House, holding up their flaming
sticks.(Everyone watches, rapt.) They pick up the pace to
finish their first cycle around the house. They then begins
circling it again.
JOSH
(to Pelle)
Can I take photos?
PELLE
(winks)
Discretely.
The elders finish their second cycle around the house, and
immediately begin a third. The community seems to be holding
its collective breath. The elders FINISH the third run-around
to reveal that Ylva’s fire is still burning, but...Dan’s
flame has been EXTINGUISHED.
A man in the audience, ISAK (50s), lets out a GASP when he
sees this. Everyone else sinks audibly with disappointment.
The elders, having finished, remove their blindfold. The
elder with the extinguished torch DEFLATES. Siv gestures
sadly to the crowd: “There we have it.”
Isak looks absolutely devastated. Christian’s eyes are on
him.
CHRISTIAN
(to Pelle)
He okay?
PELLE
Haha. The cattle are his
responsibility.
Isak’s eyes stare off, unblinking. Heartbroken. He looks to
the CATTLE HOUSE, eyes filling with tears.
MARK
(to Pelle and Christian)
How do you think he’d react if I
just put my finger in his butt
right now?
Continuing the ritual, Siv takes the torches from the elders
and walks to a healthy FIRE in a pit (this fire is always
burning; never to be allowed to extinguish).
PELLE
(to Josh and Christian)
That fire hasn’t burned out since
before I was born. It’s all of our
jobs to keep it going.
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Siv deposits the sticks into the fire.
SIV PELLE (CONT'D)
Hit men inte högre, lågorna
mina. Inte varmare! (translating)
Uh - this high is my fire,
but not higher or hotter.
(explaining)
It’s to keep the fire from
growing out of control.
Josh WRITES this down in his notebook. Christian WATCHES
Josh, slightly perturbed.
Siv now accepts a BOWL OF BEER from one of the children. She
drinks a healthy gulp, and then throws the rest into the
fire. Everyone now APPLAUDS, clapping silently. This seems to
be the end of the ritual.
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Scene 12 - Feast of Traditions
A group of TEENAGERS (all dressed in bright, formal garb)
emerge from a kitchen. They carry PLATES OF FOOD (lamb and
blood pudding) and BEER. They begin by serving the elders.
Dani sees that one of the teens is carrying an ornate platter
featuring a LAMB’S SKULL (brain exposed) and a LAMB’S HEART.
The platter is bordered by a dense spiral of INTESTINES. This
is laid onto the center of a table that has been
painstakingly decorated with local flowers.
PELLE
That’s a tradition. They just
killed that lamb today.
One server dumps a generous plate of food into the fire.
Other servers now move to our group, who are settling onto
the grass. They are handed plates and beers.
DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
(to Pelle)
Can we help at all? No no. You’re the guests. Let
yourselfs be spoiled.
One boy, RUBEN (15), walks up to Dani. He is severely
mentally handicapped and his face is horribly deformed. He’s
dressed in gorgeous linen.
RUBEN DANI
(with difficulty) (shocked)
Hej hej! Oh!
Ruben walks off. As he ambles aimlessly, people reach out to
lovingly TOUCH him - as if in reverence.
PELLE
You just met Ruben.
MARK (O.S.)
I’m sure he’s got a great
personality.
The teens finish serving. They now sit with plates of their own.
Mark has already started eating. Josh NUDGES him. Nobody else
has begun. Mark bashfully sets down his fork.
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31A CONTINUED: 31A
Silence.
Siv, the matriarch, looks to a jolly elder, STEN (60s),
sitting beside her. He stands, takes a moment, and then SINGS
a brief song to the air, as if in PRAYER.
PELLE
(whispering to Josh and Christian)
He’s giving thanks.
JOSH PELLE (CONT'D)
For the food? Yes. And the weather, and the
crops...
Sten finishes his song, and then announces:
STEN
Låt oss äta!
Everyone digs in.
CHRISTIAN
Was that praying?
PELLE
Uh - maybe not “praying.” But he
was just addressing
the...everything. The harmony and
the balance.
JOSH
Can you translate what was sung?
PELLE CHRISTIAN
...I can get a translation (jumping in)
from him later. Yeah, please, that would be
amazing.
JOSH
(eyes now burning on
Christian)
...Yes, Pelle, thank you.
Christian looks at Josh. A CHARGED moment. They start eating.
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Scene 13 - A Dance of Tensions
A beautiful, long-haired girl (16) stands before a mirror,
anxiously fussing with her hair. She needs it to look
perfect. This is MAJA.
33 EXT. HÅRGA FARMSTEAD - MINUTES LATER 33
Maja emerges from the MAIN HOUSE. All the younger Hårgans
have joined hands to form a train of people. They run and
dance in a long chain (”the long dance”). The MAYPOLE stands
at the center of their circle.
Maja timidly watches the dance, smiling. Her eyes trail off
to find our group. She alights on CHRISTIAN, instantly
smitten. It almost looks like she recognizes him.
One of the dancing boys suddenly GRABS Maja’s hand. He PULLS
her into the train. She LAUGHS as she joins, being pulled
suddenly into a HUMAN TUNNEL.
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33A EXT. HÅRGA FARMSTEAD - MEANWHILE 33A
MEANWHILE: Our group is still sitting in the same place
(along with Connie and Ingemar). They watch the passing
dancers with fascination.
PELLE
You guys should join!
DANI
I’m too scared.
SIMON approaches, carrying two beers. He momentarily gets
caught in the crossfire of a group of YOUNG BOYS CHASING EACH
OTHER. He finally reaches Connie, and hands her a beer.
SIMON CONNIE
Alright? Ta.
Simon sits.
SIMON
(re: the boys)
What are they playing?
PELLE
“Skin the fool!”
CONNIE
Skin the fool?
SIMON
(sarcastic)
Precious.
Dani notices Ingemar STARING at Simon and Connie. He looks
resentful. He finally averts his eyes and forces a smile.
MAJA, in the dancing train, is about to pass the group. She
summons the nerve to gently KICK Christian’s back. Christian
looks up to see Maja passing by. She SMILES bashfully at him.
He confusedly smiles back.
Dani notices Christian smiling, but doesn’t see Maja (who has
already turned away).
Christian RISES, suddenly feeling bold.
CHRISTIAN PELLE
(to Pelle)
How can I join the...? You’re American. Just jam
yourself in there.
Christian uneasily JUMPS IN. He joins hands with two girls.
Josh rises to follow Christian. Dani’s EYES follow them.
Pelle takes this opportunity to turn covertly to Dani:
PELLE (CONT’D)
Hey: very quick:
He hands her a folded up DRAWING.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Happy birthday.
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33A CONTINUED: 33A
Dani, surprised, opens the paper. It’s a drawing of her FACE
(donned with an extremely lush floral crown). The style is
simple, but her likeness is captured beautifully.
DANI
Oh - my gosh. Pelle!
PELLE DANI (CONT'D)
It’s just something I do for
birthdays. Maybe it’s not
appropriate? Oh my God, not at all! It’s
wonderful. Thank you, Pelle.
I’m so touched.
PELLE
Anyway. Just between us.
DANI
Yeah, well - don’t worry. Christian
forgot.
Pelle PAUSES, surprised. He doesn’t know what to say.
DANI (CONT’D)
(immediately regretting)
Or - I forgot to remind him. It
doesn’t matter. Thank you so much
for this, Pelle. It’s beautiful.
She folds the drawing back up.
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Scene 14 - Uneasy Revelations at Håрga Estate
The dance is over, although separate groups are still dancing
and playing in the BG.
Pelle is now leading our group on a TOUR. (Ingemar, Connie
and Simon have joined along.) We track alongside.
JOSH
How do you guys support this place?
PELLE INGEMAR
Lumbering, linen,
homeopathics... Water power plant.
They pass a CIRCLE OF CHILDREN, accompanied by a teacher (Dan).
They’re carving RUNIC SYMBOLS into smooth BONES.
PELLE
Schooltime over here.
CHRISTIAN
Carving runes?
Dan takes a break from teaching to look up and smile
confirmation.
PELLE
(to Dani)
Then they put it under their pillow
and dream about its power.
Dani makes an “ooh” face. Josh makes a NOTE of this.
Christian sees that they’re now passing an old RUNESTONE (on
their other side). It stands erect in an untended field.
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34 CONTINUED: 34
CHRISTIAN JOSH
Oh man - there’s a serious
one. Oh shit!
CHRISTIAN
Which alphabet is that from?
JOSH
(quick to answer)
Looks like the younger Futhark.
(to Pelle)
Right? Or is that medieval?
INGEMAR
That’s actually the Elder Futhark.
Josh nods “Ah, right” - visibly pained to be wrong.
CONNIE
(to Christian and Dani)
So, how long’ve you two been
together?
DANI
Oh, jeez...almost four years now!
CHRISTIAN
(gently correcting)
Three and a half.
DANI
(serious pause)
You’re joking. It’ll be three in
fifteen days.
Christian thinks about that, and grudgingly concedes.
CHRISTIAN
Okay, no, that is true.
(off Dani’s look)
It is! You’re absolutely right.
He makes a “sowwy” face, kisses her incredulous cheek, and
changes the subject by asking Simon, Connie and Ingemar:
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
How did you guys all meet?
They look at each other. “Who answers?”
INGEMAR
Well...we were all working on the same
farm, and funny enough: I was dating
Connie when Simon and me first became
pals.
Simon’s eyes narrow. Connie looks very confused.
CONNIE
(correcting)
Well - we‘d been on a date. Which I
wasn’t even actually aware that it was a
date.
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34 CONTINUED: 34
INGEMAR
(backtracking jovially)
Right, no, I meant that Connie and
me had just become friends - we
decided to be friends - and that was
just before Connie and Simon started
dating. And now they're engaged!
DANI INGEMAR (CONT'D)
Oh wow. Congratulations. Which is amazing. Yes.
Congratulations.
Simon and Connie look uncomfortable. They smile “thank you.”
SIMON
(to Dani)
We’ve actually asked Ingemar to
officiate the wedding.
DANI
(excited)
You did?
SIMON
Nope!
Everybody LAUGHS - including Ingemar.
Christian points out a GIANT TRIANGULAR HOUSE which stands
isolated in a large field. It has been painted a vivid
yellow. (Two teen boys hang out beside it.)
CHRISTIAN
What about that house?
PELLE
Ah, that’s like a sacred temple. No
one’s allowed in there.
CHRISTIAN
Looks like it was just built.
MARK
(mock sinister tune)
Ooooweeeyooooh.
Changing the subject, Pelle motions toward the MAIN HOUSE.
PELLE
Let me show you where we sleep!
He leads them toward it. Meanwhile, Ingemar leads Simon and
Connie in another direction.
INGEMAR
Here: come see the Rotvälta!
Our group walks off into the BG, and as they go, Ingemar and
his crew walk profile in the MG. We follow alongside them. On
their way, they pass a CAGED BEAR (which our group is also
passing with curiosity in the BG).
SIMON
So we’re just gonna ignore the
bear, then.
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34 CONTINUED: 34
INGEMAR
(acknowledging, deadpan)
That’s a bear.
Connie sees a LONG CARPET that has been hung up
(horizontally) on a clothesline in the FG. She approaches to
check it out. Simon follows.
CONNIE
This is fucking cool.
Continuing the lateral track, we move slowly along it (having
now become Connie’s POV). In a series of seven panels, the
carpet dramatizes the following...
1) A love-stricken girl in a server outfit (profile) stares
longingly, with hearts for eyes, at a boy sitting frontal..
2) The girl in a large field, walking backwards as she
gathers flowers. 3) A dual-panel, first depicting: The girl
laying flowers under her pillow. And then: the girl asleep,
dreaming about the boy. A dream bubble hovers over her head.
Inside of it: the girl and the boy (with spiraling eyes) are
kissing at their wedding. 4) The girl in the kitchen. She
crouches over a coffee cup and drips menstrual blood into the
cup. 5) A triple panel, first depicting: The girl snips off
her pubic hairs, then a close-up of the pubic hair being
snipped, and then the girl mixing the disparate hairs into
pancake batter. 6) The girl handing the boy the pancake as he
drinks the coffee. 7) The boy’s face, spirals for eyes. 8)
The boy kisses the girl, who is now pregnant in a wedding
dress. They both have hearts for eyes.
SIMON (O.S.)
Wait. Is she dripping period blood
into the drink?
CONNIE (O.S.)
How do you think I nailed you down?
We have passed the carpet to see our group arriving at the
Main House in the BG.
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Scene 15 - A New World, New Traditions
Josh leads our group through the two-storied interior of the
huge, barn-shaped house. There is a large, square HOLE in the
floor of the second story (so both stories are visible to
each other). On both floors, the walls are lined with BEDS.
The center of the bottom story is bare, like a dance floor.
MARK
Holy shit!
(pointing out paintings)
Dick painting. Dick painting. Dick
with a pussy in the middle. A pussy
shitting out a dick.
Mark throws his bag onto one of them.
The group marvels at the walls, which are covered in
INTRICATE MURALS. Runic letters abound. The CEILING is
especially impressive.
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35 CONTINUED: 35
CHRISTIAN
Who all sleeps in here?
PELLE
All the younger ones. Until we turn
thirty-six. Then we move to the
laborer’s house.
JOSH
Why thirty-six?
Josh has pulled out his NOTEPAD, ready to write down Pelle’s
answer. Christian (almost in response) pulls out his phone,
ready to type. Pelle PAUSES at this. He then explains,
gesturing to a MURAL that dramatizes the following:
PELLE
We think of life like the seasons.
You are a child until 18, and
that’s the Spring. At some point
we all do our Pilgrimage, and
that’s between 18 and 36. That is
Summer. Then, from 36 to 54,
you’re of working age, which is
Fall. And finally from 54 to 72,
you become a mentor.
Josh and Christian have written all this down - their eyes
intermittently piercing each other. (Josh finishes with “53-
72 -- Mentor -- WINTER”.)
DANI
What happens when you turn 72,
then?
Pelle makes a comical THROAT SLASH gesture. Dani laughs, and
begins to walk off.
CHRISTIAN MARK
Not a lot of privacy. What do
you do when you need to jerk
off? Or give yourself an enema.
Now that Dani is away, Pelle crosses quietly to Christian. He
covertly ushers him aside.
Dani has found a wall of many FRAMED PHOTOGRAPHS. They all
feature a different young woman dressed in ceremonial garb.
In each photo, the woman is richly adorned in summer flowers
and wears an impressive FLORAL CROWN. These photos have been
taken annually for the last dozen years.
Dani looks over to notice Pelle still talking to Christian,
who now has one hand behind his back. He looks extremely
GUILTY. She interrupts by bluntly asking:
DANI
Are these the May Queens?
PELLE
Oh - that’s right! You’ll actually
be here for that.
CHRISTIAN
Who are the “May Queens”?
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35 CONTINUED: 35
PELLE
Every midsummer we have a dance
competition and the winner gets
crowned.
A PRETTY BRUNETTE (25) steps up to the door:
PRETTY BRUNETTE
(announcing)
Barnen tittar på Austin Powers om
ni vill vara med? På fält fem.
She looks to Mark, SMILES bashfully and waves. She then
leaves.
MARK
Wait a minute. Did you just see
that?
Christian, hand behind his back, now sneaks over to Dani.
CHRISTIAN
Hey. Can I just pull you...?
Christian ushers her gently out of the front door. They
move to the Front Steps. Beyond them, four women (all
different ages) are gathered closely as they SING SOFTLY
(”heydihrudi...”) to a crying baby. Struck by this, Dani
watches this for a second. As she does so, Christian
produces a SOCKERKAKA (sponge cake) from behind his back. A
candle protrudes.
DANI
(confused)
What?
CHRISTIAN
Happy birthday.
He struggles to light the candle with a bad lighter. He
finally succeeds.
DANI
Where did that come from?
CHRISTIAN
I’ve been trying to find a time to
surprise you all day.
Dani just looks at him with utter suspicion.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
What? You thought I forgot?
Christian finally RELENTS with a guilty smile:
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
I’m sorry. I’m really sorry. I
didn’t know it was tomorrow
already. With the sun.
He kisses her. She doesn’t kiss back. He keeps kissing.
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35 CONTINUED: 35
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D) DANI
Happy birthday, happy Fine. It’s fine.
birthday, I’m sorry. I’m not upset.
- You should be. - I know I should!
He kisses her again, tenderly. She grudgingly kisses back.
The baby is still crying in the BG.
CHRISTIAN
Happy birthday, mouse.
She forces a tight smile and BLOWS OUT the candle.
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37 *OMITTED* 37
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Scene 16 - Unease in the Village
A high angle wide of the village. Almost everyone, save for
some stragglers, are inside. The sun is low, looking like
evening (but we are past midnight).
38A INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - SAME TIME 38A
The windows have been boarded up for the night. Soft sunlight
peeks from the edges.
People are climbing into their beds. The baby is still
CRYING, now in his CRIB, which is stationed near the beds
of women in their twenties. The crib is made of severe-
looking iron and metal. One woman lays a PAIR OF SCISSORS
under the baby’s mattress.
Dani, noticing this, looks inquiringly to Pelle.
PELLE
The iron keeps away the “invisibles.”
So the babies don’t get “changed.”
Pelle smiles sardonically, knowing how it sounds.
DANI
How real is that stuff for you guys?
PELLE
(deflecting)
Ah, who knows?
Dani smiles. She looks over to Christian, whose eyes are GLUED
TENSELY to Josh’s notepad as he scrawls “Iron. Babies changed.
‘Invisibles.’” Christian looks threatened.
Pelle has already climbed into bed.
PELLE (CONT’D)
All right - beauty rest! Tomorrow’s
a big day.
JOSH
And what’s tomorrow?
PELLE
(mysterious)
First of the big ceremonies.
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38A CONTINUED: 38A
Bemused, Josh looks dead-eyed at Pelle. Waiting for more.
Pelle PAUSES, then takes Josh’s notepad. He writes
“Ättestupan” and hands it back.
Josh happens to know that word. His eyes WIDEN. “Are you
serious?” Pelle smiles mischievously.
CHRISTIAN
What’s that? What’s Attestupan?
Pelle gestures for Christian to keep his voice down.
Christian pulls out his phone and types “Atestupan” into a
search engine. But there’s no internet connection.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Fuck.
(to Josh and Pelle)
What’s Ättestupan?
Josh smugly climbs into bed. This has made Dani nervous.
DANI
(to Josh)
Is it scary?
Josh teasingly raises his eyebrows: “You’ll see.”
MARK (O.S.)
Christian: do you wanna check my
scalp for ticks and then I can check
your scalp?
39 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - “NIGHT” 39
Everyone is asleep. Silence, save for the baby’s CRYING.
Dani lies AWAKE. Beside her: Christian sleeping soundly. To
her other side: Mark SNORING.
Dani shifts her weight. She looks over at the wall mural, and
notices an ILLUSTRATION of a HAPPY MAN OPENING HIS WRIST WITH A
SPECIAL KNIFE. He is surrounded by smiling friends, and above
him, a smiling SUN. Dani looks unnerved, but her attention is
suddenly DRAWN AWAY by the SOUND of...
A teenaged BOY and GIRL (clearly new lovers) sneak quietly
out of their beds. Giggling. They tip-toe out of the house,
careful to make no noise.
Dani stares at this. Heavy.
40 *OMITTED* 40
41 *OMITTED* 41
42 EXT. FIELD - MORNING 42
In an open field, a group of WOMEN collect the morning DEW
(in small vials) from the leaves and grass. They throw a
SHEET over the wet grass. It absorbs the dew, and they WRING
it out into a pail.
We TRACK ACROSS this, finally panning away to find...several
men are setting up DINING TABLES in the BG, the fire temple
just beyond them. They are laying the tables out to form a
runic pattern.
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42 CONTINUED: 42
We continue panning past this to find a large GROUP that has
assembled for what appears to be some sort of DANCE CLASS (we
see them in a medium wide, gently pulling back). They stand
in rows of ten. At the head of the class is YLVA, one of the
elders who carried the torch around the house. In
demonstration, she lifts her arm and waves it fluidly,
rhythmically, EMOTIONALLY, back and forth. (This is
accompanied by a Hårgan, OSKAR, who sings a wordless emotion-
based song - not dissimilar to speaking in tongues. The dance
is inspired by this song.) The class IMITATES the dancer.
They strive to perfectly match her movements and emotions.
(Josh watches raptly in the BG.)
Finally, we’ve pulled back far enough to reveal Dani’s
shoulder in the FG. She’s watching the dance class, having
just woken up. She then turns to look around, marvelling at
the structure of the community around her. She SITS DOWN
cross-legged, being mindful to soak it in.
43 EXT. FARMSTEAD - ONE HOUR LATER 43
The dining tables have been set up to form a RUNE
(representing the “cultivation of art, soul and craft”).
Half of the community is already standing at the tables. The
other half is arriving now. Plates of food have already been
placed. No one sits.
OUR GROUP (minus Dani) arrives at one of the tables. They
gaze around, trying to understand the etiquette. They notice
that a few lingering GIRLS walk backwards through a
neighboring field, picking FLOWERS.
MARK
Someone should tell those girls
that they’re walking stupid.
DANI now appears with a bouquet of HANDPICKED FLOWERS. She
happily presents Christian with the bouquet.
CHRISTIAN
What?! For me?
DANI
Ja!
CHRISTIAN
(accepting them with strained
appreciation)
...Tack så mycket.
He kisses her cheek.
Now that everyone is stationed at the tables, a BOY runs off
to officially summon the guests of honor by ringing a BELL at
the end of a table.
After a moment, TWO ELDERS (72), both wearing ornate golden
dresses, enter the scene. (We will recognize them as Dan and
Ylva, the elders who ran around the Main House with the
flaming torches.) They stand with alert posture, maintaining
an awareness of their bodies as they walk. They arrive at TWO
LARGE WOODEN CHAIRS, situated at the head of a beautifully
decorated table with fine silverware and golden plates.
(Every other table seats at least five people, but this table
has been reserved solely for these two.)
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43 CONTINUED: 43
Josh mouths to Pelle: “Are those the ones?” Pelle smiles.
The two elders SIT. This prompts everyone else to sit.
Mark picks up his fork, only to notice that no one else has
begun eating. Everyone waits patiently. Total SILENCE, save
for the baby who is still crying.
Finally, the two men pick up their silverware and begin to
eat. Now everyone starts eating.
Josh is scrutinizing every detail. Christian scrutinizes
Josh.
43A EXT. FARMSTEAD - MID-MEAL 43A
MAJA feverishly carves a small RUNE STONE in her lap. She is
hunched over to conceal her progress from curious eyes.
The two elders are receiving lots of attention.
Next to Dani, a blonde woman, KARIN (20s), cradles the CRYING
BABY. She rests her forehead against the baby’s forehead and
moans empathically. She notices Dani watching this, and she
turns and SMILES.
DANI KARIN
(catching herself)
Oh, God, I’m sorry. I was No no...
gawking.
DANI
Is your baby okay?
KARIN
Oh, she will be. She has the, em
- rickets? Where the bones are
bad? She is not “mine,” though.
DANI BLONDE WOMAN
Oh, I’m sorry to presume! No no - her birth mother is
on pilgrimage. It helps them
to detach. The babies are
raised here by everyone.
Dani smiles at this idea. Josh and Christian are also taken
by this. Josh SEES Christian’s excitement, and quietly
HARDENS.
KARIN
(to Dani)
How is your family like?
DANI
Mine? Oh no, mine are...
Dani makes a comic throat-slashing gesture, recalling
Pelle’s; she then instantly feels guilty about it. Christian
suddenly looks nervous about this exchange.
KARIN
Oh no! I’m so sorry. All of them?
Karin already has TEARS welling in her eyes. She looks
sincerely affected by this.
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43A CONTINUED: 43A
DANI
(reacting)
Oh God, no, I’m sorry. I shouldn’t
have said. We’re enjoying our food.
KARIN
(now worried for Dani)
Am I making you sad to ask?
DANI
No, not at all! I just shouldn’t have
mentioned it.
BLONDE WOMAN DANI (CONT'D)
Please know we can talk if
you like. Please. I am happy (uncomfortable)
Okay, thank you. Sorry. I
to talk. feel silly. Thank you.
(to Christian)
Sorry.
Christian shrugs: “Don’t apologize to me.”
SIV, a table over, has been avidly watching this exchange.
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Scene 17 - The Journey to Ättestupan
Everyone has finished eating. Another HUSH falls awkwardly over
the procession. Silence, save for the wailing baby.
Mark, half-asleep, confusedly looks around. He sees the
Pretty Brunette (from earlier) SMILING at him. Caught off
guard, he BLUSHES and smiles back (a little too eagerly).
One of the two elders STANDS. This is YLVA. She clears her
throat. Closes her eyes. After a moment, Ylva begins to SING
a wordless, choral song.
Everyone watches, rapt and emotional.
At the appropriate time, the other man (DAN) begins to sing
along, softly and awkwardly at first. Soon he rises, singing
with greater projection.
MARK
(whispering to Josh)
How do you think he’d react if I
just put my finger in his butt
right now?
When the song comes to a finish, SIV stands to RAISE her
glass. This prompts everyone else to stand. They all raise
their aquavit.
A long silence. Everyone is very calm. And present. Dani is
MOVED. She holds up her glass, feeling energy from the group.
Siv finally DRINKS. So does everyone else. The MUSICIANS
begin to play their handmade instruments, and EIGHT MIDDLE-
AGED MEN break into two groups. They walk to either of the
elder’s chairs, HOIST them up, and start CARRYING THEM OFF.
The congregation follows behind as the elevated elders are
carried up a hill. Our group JOINS them, confused. Mark lags
behind.
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43A CONTINUED: 43A
MARK (CONT’D)
(to the group)
I’m gonna take a nap. My head feels
like a sewage blimp.
Mark heads back toward the Main House. Dani, Christian, Josh
and Pelle proceed to follow the community.
44 EXT. HILL - MINUTES LATER 44
Everyone happily follows the elders of honor (still carried
on hoisted thrones). They follow a narrow TRAIL OF FLOWERS up
a hill.
There is a FORK in the trail, leading either to the left and
downward or continuing straight ahead and upward.
Ylva and Dan are carried straight ahead, continuing to ascend
the rising hill. The following procession BRANCHES OFF to
veer left. They continue down a slope that leads to the
valley of a cliff.
Our group, squinting with curiosity, begins following the
procession toward the valley. But Pelle slows down.
PELLE
Okay - actually:
He holds them back.
PELLE (CONT’D)
I need to warn you before we go
down...
(to Dani now)
...because you could not want to.
DANI
Is this the thing you mentioned
last night?
JOSH
(smirking)
Ättestupan.
PELLE
We’re about to perform a centuries-
old ritual that is very important to
us and very beautiful, but also -
very far from anything you have in
America.
DANI
(suddenly nervous)
...Do I not want to do this?
PELLE
Well - that’s what I’m saying.
You’re invited to. I just...
(pauses)
You remember I explained the winter
stage of a man’s life? 54 to 72?
Well, this is what happens when 72
gets reached.
DANI
Okay. And what is “this”?
Pelle pauses, considering his words. Dani grows more nervous.
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DANI (CONT’D)
What is Ättestupan?
Josh can’t suppress a smile - anticipating Pelle’s answer.
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Scene 18 - The Ritual of the Cliffs
The community has gathered on the rocky valley. Tall CLIFFS
loom imposingly. The baby cries in the BG.
Our group stands to the side, along with Simon, Connie and
Ingemar. Christian turns to DANI, who looks extremely uneasy.
CHRISTIAN
Are you sure you can handle this?
Dani doesn’t know the answer to this.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Maybe you should go back to the
main house? It’s not too late.
Dani starts to wrestle with this, but then:
DANI
No. I need to try.
A HORN sounds. All eyes go to...
SIV holds a WOOD-BOUND BOOK whose cover is marked by runic
letters. She opens it and reads in silence for a moment. Its
scripture is written in runes and unknown hieroglyphs (the
AFFECT language).
JOSH
(to Pelle, whispering)
What’s that book?
Christian leans in to hear the whispered answer:
PELLE
Rubi Radr. Our scripture.
JOSH
Can I read that?
PELLE
You would not be able.
CU of Rubi Radr’s pages, as held open by Siv. They are indeed
indecipherable to common eyes.
Siv, eyes on the page, surprises our group by beginning to
SING a wordless hymn. It’s beautiful, yet feels improvised,
as if inspired (on the spot) by emotions provoked by the
text.
46 EXT. CLIFF - SAME TIME 46
The two elders have been carried to the top of a CLIFF
overlooking the beach. Their chairs are SET DOWN near the
precipice. They are placed beside freshly carved (and
impressively sized) RUNE STONES.
The elders rise from their seats and then stoically put out
their hands. Specially ordained men then draw CEREMONIAL
BLADES across their palms, DRAWING BLOOD.
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46 CONTINUED: 46
Ylva and Dan rub their palms together, making their hands
nice and bloody. They press their palms onto their rune
stones, both leaving TWO BLOODY HAND-PRINTS.
45A EXT. BEACH - SAME TIME 45A
Everyone looks up at the cliff’s peak. Dani is SWEATING BEADS
now, her breathing erratic.
Finally, YLVA appear at the edge.
Rapt silence.
Ylva stands there for a long time.
Mesmerized, Josh steps slowly to the side (away from Dani and
Christian) to get a better look. His eyes are glued to the
cliff-top.
Ylva, having now summoned total confidence, assumes a GRAND
POSE, twisting her arms and legs into a standing fetal
position, and extending her neck/head into a glorious reach
for the heavens. This pose represents a final statement.
Dani BRACES herself. Her TEETH begin to chatter. She GRABS
Christian’s arm, and then --
Ylva LEAPS OFF THE PRECIPICE. Connie and Simon SCREAM. The
woman plummets 200 feet to LAND FATALLY on the jagged rocks
below. Upon impact, a FLOCK OF BIRDS ALIGHTS from a tree.
Connie SCREAMS.
Our group is shocked into horrified silence. Dani looks like
she’s been knocked out of her body. The birds fly over Dani’s
head, and a sudden rush courses through her.
Disassociated, Dani turns to look at Connie and Simon, who
are freaking out.
Then Christian points upward, redirecting Dani’s dazed
attention to the cliff-top. Dani’s EYES scan back up to
see...
DAN - the elder whose torch burnt out before circling the
house three times - is now stepping up to the precipice. He
also strikes a POSE, also reaching for the awesome, but his
is slightly clumsier. He wobbles, but he holds the pose.
While holding it, he turns to look down...at Dani.
SIMON
(panicking)
What’s happening? Is he gonna jump,
too? No--
Dan LAUNCHES HIMSELF OFF THE CLIFF, jumping vertically.
Connie GASPS. Dan plummets straight down, but his left foot
lands on the large rock that killed Ylva. This obliterates
his leg and sends him falling brutally to his side. Dan,
unfortunately not dead, WAILS in horrible pain.
The community grumbles with concern. Everyone turns to
THREE MEN - each the oldest of their respective generations
(the youths, the laborers, and the mentors). They
understand what they must do.
SIMON (CONT’D)
Why did that just happen? We need
to call an ambulance.
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45A CONTINUED: 45A
INGEMAR SIMON (CONT'D)
It’s okay. What’s okay?! CALL AN
AMBULANCE! Everybody’s just
watching!
Sten approaches the three men with a CUDGEL. This is a long-
handled club with a pointed block of wood at the end. The
cudgel is handed over to the MENTOR.
Dani watches, overwhelmed, as the three men (now armed with
the cudgel) stalk over to Dan. The dying man moans
pathetically, in too much pain to scream.
From DANI’S POV: The men have arrived at Dan’s feet. The
mentor RAISES the cudgel, and brutally swings it down onto
Dan’s HEAD. This isn’t a fatal blow. The man raises the
cudgel again, and this time he STRIKES Dan with enough
force to silence him.
The mentor hands the cudgel to the LABORER. He raises the
cudgel and brings it down onto the old man’s crown. The
elder’s leg goes into pathetic SPASMS. Blood gurgling. The
laborer BLUDGEONS him once more. Dan goes limp, probably
dead.
The YOUTH is now handed the cudgel. He delivers two brutal
swings to Dan’s head. The mentor gently takes the cudgel away
from the youth, and they all return to the community. The
mentor hands Sten the cudgel, and everyone stands in
respectful, contemplative silence.
Dani is GRIPPING Christian’s arm. She is completely shell-
shocked. Christian turns to Josh; they exchange “holy shit”
looks. More EXCITED than troubled.
Siv bounds over to Connie and Simon, who are in a panic. Dani
trembles, powder-white. Traumatized.
SIV INGEMAR
Ingemar! Did you not warn I’m sorry, grandmother Siv! I
them? kind of warned them.
SIMON
Nobody did anything! Everyone just
watched that!
SIV SIMON (CONT'D)
Oh my, poor things-- You’re all just standing
calmly around!!
SIV
Oh, mercy - please--
Siv tries to lay an empathic hand on Simon and Connie’s
shoulder, but Simon RECOILS.
SIV (CONT’D) SIMON
You should have been warned
better. What you just saw is
a long, long, long observed
custom. Those two men have Custom?!
just reached the end of their
life-cycle.
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45A CONTINUED: 45A
Siv now looks into DANI’S eyes, but Dani is in a daze. She
seems to have been knocked into a dissociative state. Siv
speaks quickly to avoid being interrupted.
SIV
You must understand it as a great
joy for them. And when it is my
turn, it will be great joy for me.
(back to Simon and Connie)
We view life like a circle. Yes? A re-
cycle. One thing falls and another
raises. The first lady who jumped: her
name was Ylva. Yes?
Siv points to a PREGNANT WOMAN:
SIV (CONT’D)
That baby, who is not yet born,
will inherit this name and also be
Ylva. And if it’s a boy, he will
take the name of Dan.
Dani gazes at Siv, who has taken on a strange ETHEREAL GLOW
(like an angel).
SIV (CONT’D)
But instead of getting old and dying
with shame and pain and fear, we
give our life. As a gesture. Out of
gratefulness. Before it can spoil.
Siv releases Simon and Connie, who are no less fraught. Siv
now addresses the whole group.
SIV (CONT’D)
It does no good to die lashing
back at the inevitable. It
corrupts the spirit.
INGEMAR
(to Simon and Connie)
I’m sorry I did not warn you
better.
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Scene 19 - Stolen Research
Everyone is walking back from the beach. JOSH rushes
feverishly toward the Main House. Christian’s eyes are
trained on him as he moves to Dani, who looks destroyed.
CHRISTIAN
You okay, sweetie?
DANI
(branching off)
I need to not be here right now.
CHRISTIAN
Okay. Good idea. I’ll find you in a
bit?
Dani walks off, addled. Christian ACCELERATES to follow Josh.
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49 EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER 49
Dani’s walk speeds into a SPRINT. Once out of sight, she
stops behind the triangular temple, now HYPERVENTILATING. She
tries to steady her breath, but it’s too erratic. She breaks
down into violent SOBS. These are interrupted by a shrill
RETCH.
49A EXT. STAGE - SAME TIME 49A
Two Hårgan men remove two stools from the stage (those
belonging to Ylva and Dan) and rearrange the remaining
stools. Mark watches.
In the BG, Josh arrives at the Main House and enters.
Christian hastily approaches in the distance.
MARK
(to Josh’s disappearing
back)
How was the thing?
50 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - SECONDS LATER 50
Josh anxiously pulls his LAPTOP from his backpack. He sits on
the mattress as the computer boots up.
Christian enters awkwardly - eyes on Josh. He appears to be
summoning the courage to say something. He closes the door
behind him.
CHRISTIAN
Hey dude...
JOSH
Hey!
(excitedly)
Holy shit, right?
CHRISTIAN JOSH (CONT'D)
Holy shit. Incredible. Incredible!
Christian works up the nerve:
CHRISTIAN
So listen: I’ve been wanting to ask
you, or tell you, or just - mention to
you something I’ve been thinking
about...
Josh looks up. He DARKENS with concern.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
I’ve just been thinking, and I’ve
decided...I really think I wanna do
my thesis here. On Hårga.
Josh doesn’t react. Christian nervously continues:
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
And I wanted to tell you first, so
that it didn’t seem like I wasn’t
telling you.
JOSH
I feel like I can’t tell if you’re
joking.
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Christian doesn’t respond. Josh becomes incredulous.
JOSH (CONT’D)
(barely containing his
rage)
You know I’m out here doing my
thesis, on midsummer. That’s why I’m
here.
CHRISTIAN
Yeah, but not on this community.
Josh’s eyes BURN on Christian. Christian maintains an
innocent demeanor.
JOSH
...You knew I was gonna want to do
this.
CHRISTIAN JOSH (CONT'D)
How would I know that? Oh my God, Christian, of
Did you even know that before course you did!
I just told you?
JOSH (CONT’D)
You think I don’t know what you’re
doing? It’s actually kind of
outrageously unsubtle. The fact that
you’re being this bald about it. I’m
honestly impressed.
CHRISTIAN
What the fuck?
JOSH
Oh, yeah - “What the fuck.”
(seething)
This is what I’ve been working
towards and you know it. That’s why
you look so guilty right now.
Because you know - you know - that
what you’re doing is unethical and
leechy and lazy and frankly kind of
sad--
CHRISTIAN JOSH (CONT'D)
Okay, wow, fuck you-- No dude, not fuck me! Find
your own subject - or your
own passion. Because I’m
actually invested in this.
It’s not some glorified hobby
that I’m casually dipping my
feet into.
CHRISTIAN
Oh my God! In case you forgot, Your
Highness, we’re both earning the
same degree--
JOSH
But we’re not doing it in the same
way, Christian. Okay? I have to hold
your little hand through everything.
You didn’t even know how to use J-Stor
before I taught you, and you’re a
fucking grad student. I mean, why are
you even in academia? You don’t care!
(MORE)
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50 CONTINUED: 50
JOSH (CONT'D)
Which is fine! That’s your
prerogative! Just don’t appropriate my
actual work for your new shortcut!
This cuts Christian like a knife. His eyes are flaring with
RAGE. But he stifles it. Determined to remain collected, he
concludes:
CHRISTIAN
I wanna do my thesis here. If you
want to as well, I’d be happy to
discuss collaborating. If not, I
guess we’ll have two separate theses
on the Hårgas.
Christian leaves.
Josh sits motionless.
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Scene 20 - Secrets and Conflict at the Farmstead
Christian emerges from the Main House, extremely tense. Near
the door, a very pale SIMON smokes a cigarette with Connie.
Mark stands with them, stunned.
MARK
Wait, though: for real? The two old
ones? With the singing?
SIMON CONNIE
I can’t stay here four more
days, I’m sorry. That’s fine. I can’t, either.
Mark turns to Christian:
MARK
Christian dude: of all the things
to let me sleep through!
Simon sees Christian’s demeanor.
SIMON
We feel the same way, mate.
Fuming, Christian just acknowledges Simon with a tight-lipped
smile. Looking out, he then notices in the FIELD: several men
and women are decorating a TREE that has been pulled from the
earth and is now elevated on its side. Among the decorators
he sees MAJA, working with her friend ULLA (28). They laugh
as they work.
Christian gestures “excuse me” to Simon, and approaches Maja.
As he walks toward her, he passes several other people
working in the BG.
CHRISTIAN
Excuse me? Hi. Sorry to bother
you...
Maja looks up - not understanding. She looks almost panicked.
MAJA
(not sure of the word)
Hello.
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51 CONTINUED: 51
CHRISTIAN
I’m Christian.
Ulla insert herself:
YOUNG WOMAN
Hello. I am Ulla. She is Maja.
CHRISTIAN
Hi Ulla. Maja. I, uh -- What are you
guys doing?
ULLA
Decorating the tree!
Christian tries to ignore that Maja is staring at him with
wide eyes. Some of the working men also stare.
CHRISTIAN
I was wondering, uh, if I could
ask -
(pulls out pen and paper)
- how many of those Attestupans you
guys have seen performed.
ULLA
Every time one reaches age.
CHRISTIAN ULLA (CONT'D)
Okay... So lots.
CHRISTIAN
Right. Okay. And what would be, like,
a typical mourning period? For
grieving?
ULLA
We grieve and celebrate.
Maja is still staring at Christian, love-stricken. He is
aware of it, but tries to ignore.
ULLA (CONT’D)
We must go now and keep work going.
CHRISTIAN
Okay. No problem. Thank you. I
might find you to ask more later?
Ulla smiles “okay” and walks off with Maja. They wave
goodbye.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Goodbye.
(to Maja)
‘Bye Maja.
Maja smiles timidly and waves goodbye again.
MAJA
(turning away)
Hello.
Christian smiles and turns. His smile evaporates, however,
when he sees...
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JOSH is standing near the stage, talking to PELLE.
JOSH
And I told Christian this already,
and now I think he’s trying to
pretend that it was his idea, so if
he comes to you--
PELLE
Well, no, hey, wait a minute: I
seriously doubt the elders will
approve of anything being written.
They’re extremely protective..
JOSH
So I can just use aliases for
everything. Solved.
PELLE
Then what would be the point? You
couldn’t even get it peer reviewed.
(before Josh can argue)
Christian did already ask me this,
by the way. I told him the exact
thing I’m telling you.
JOSH
...I thought you just said he
hadn’t talked to you.
PELLE
(annoyed)
Fuck, look: I’ll ask the elders.
But if it is approved, you either
both do it together or you fight it
out between yourselfs.
Pelle puts his hands up to signify “That’s it.” He walks off.
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Scene 21 - A Ceremony of Fire and Water
The corpses of Ylva and Dan are carried (by Hårgan men) to
the everlasting fire pit. They are lowered carefully onto the
flames. Hårgans stand soberly about, respectful.
52 EXT. MEADOW - “EVENING” 52
Dani sits cross-legged near the lake. Her eyes are closed.
She’s trying to meditate, but her breathing is still
unstable.
Christian appears behind her.
CHRISTIAN
Hey.
Dani’s eyes open with a start. She turns to him.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
How we doing?
DANI
I can’t stop fucking shaking and my
teeth keep chattering.
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52 CONTINUED: 52
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
I can imagine. Today was a Feels like the neck on my
lot. skin is getting tighter. Like
I’m choking.
Dani pulls at her neck. Christian puts a hand on her
shoulder.
CHRISTIAN
You gonna be okay?
DANI
(looking up at him)
Are you just not at all disturbed
by what happened?
CHRISTIAN
I mean, of course, it was shocking.
But I’m also trying to keep an open
mind.
Dani just stares at him.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
It’s - cultural. We abandon our
elderly to nursing homes. I’m sure
they find that disturbing.
Dani EYES him, disturbed by his nonchalance. She then sees...
In the b.g., a congregation of MEN and WOMEN (all holding
lanterns) are migrating off together. At the front of the
queue are men carrying the BEJEWELLED TREE (which we saw the
men decorating earlier).
DAGNY, whom we met earlier, splits from the group to RUN over
to Dani and Christian.
DAGNY
Hello! Do you like to joining us
with a special ceremony?
DANI
Why? What’s happening now?
DAGNY
Special.
DANI
(to Christian, whispering)
I can’t do another thing.
Dani looks to the queue, fraught. Among the line-up is an
equally unnerved CONNIE.
CHRISTIAN (O.S.)
It’s okay. We can brave it
together.
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52 CONTINUED: 52
Dani (pulling again at her neck, still feeling claustrophobic
in her own skin) and Christian uneasily join Connie among the
migrating crowd. They’re approaching a LAKE, which seems to
GLOW in the distance.
DANI
Did they tell you what this is?
CONNIE
(shakes head)
Someone better not be launching off
another fucking cliff.
Christian sees MARK behind them, and slows down to join him.
CHRISTIAN
Hey.
MARK
(whispering)
Dude. The Elvira girl behind us
keeps giving me sex eyes, but she
speaks like zero English.
Mark is talking about the PRETTY BRUNETTE from earlier. She
walks behind them (a few bodies away). Christian turns to
look.
MARK (CONT’D)
No, dude, I didn’t say “look.”
Don’t fucking announce it.
Christian turns back.
MARK (CONT’D)
Anyway, I’m in love with her.
CHRISTIAN
(can’t help himself)
Don’t you fuckin’ kinda hate Josh?
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56 EXT. LAKE - SAME TIME 56
Everyone arrives at a lake. Trees at the short have been
decorated with lanterns, and torches glow at the opposite
side of the water.
Siv walks up to a mystified Dani and Connie.
SIV
Do you admire the Brisinga-smycket?
CONNIE
The lanterns?
SIV
Glädje’s necklace. We give it now to
her mother, Kärlek, as praise for
creating our sun.
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Dani and Connie don’t understand, nor do they inquire
further. Siv laughs, seeing their confusion.
SIV (CONT’D)
(to Connie)
Think of it like theatre. Strictly
presentational. Yes?
Dani placates her by nodding. Siv smiles.
HARD CUT TO:
56A EXT. LAKE - MINUTES LATER 56A
A BELL is rung. Everyone’s attention has gone to the front of
the lake. Dani looks extremely nervous.
IRMA stands at the center of the shore. She SINGS a brief
wordless song and then announces to the lake:
IRMA
Med tacksamhet och lovord, du ärade
gudinna, överlämnar vi denna
blygsamma gåva.
Music is played as the men HOIST up the lavishly decorated
tree, run it towards the lake, and HURL it into the water.
The lake gulps the tree down.
A HORN bellows.
A thin man, SVEN (40s), steps out to announce, quite
theatrically:
SVEN
Åh nej! Hör ni mullrandet? Jag tror
hon ännu är hungrig.
IRMA
Jag hörde inget mullrande.
(to the crowd)
Gjorde någon av er?
Grumblings all around. The consensus is “no.”
SVEN
Jaså, antar att det kan ha varit
min egen mage.
Some polite laughter among the congregation.
SVEN (CONT’D)
Men jag vill inte riskera att
förarga vår generösa Moder.
IRMA
Inte jag heller. Men vi har redan
skänkt bort våra finaste ägodelar
och mest fruktbara träd. Vad mer
kan vi möjligen erbjuda?
Then a YOUNG BOY (10) is heard among the crowd. This is BROR.
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56A CONTINUED: 56A
BROR (O.S.)
Vi kan använda mig!
The crowd OPENS UP to reveal Bror. He is adorned in the same
jewels and flowers as the tree. His costume is an imitation
of the tree’s. He is clearly reciting lines (with less
confidence than Sven and Irma).
IRMA
Du, unga Bror, önskar erbjuda ditt
liv till vår älskade Gudinna?
BROR
Om hon vill ha det!
SVEN
Så modig du är, lilla Bror!
BROR
Modig? Vad är modigt med att resa
hem?
Horns are played as Bror steps forward to stand before the
men who tossed the tree. They reluctantly strap WEIGHTS to
the boy’s ankles and arms. They then lift the boy up and
carry him to the lake.
Dani starts to PANIC.
DANI
(to Siv)
No. What’s happening?
Siv SMILES.
The boy is taken to the edge of the lake, and the men begin
to SWING him back and forth. They are preparing to launch him
into the water.
DANI (CONT’D)
NO!!!
This mingles with other protestations from the crowd:
HÅRGAN #1
Nej, sluta!
HÅRGAN #2
Låt honom vara! Han har visat sitt
mod!
The crowd erupts into a CACOPHONY OF STAGED PROTEST (”No!
Release him!”). The men stop swinging the boy. After
sufficient heckling, the men RELEASE the boy. He then runs to
SIV, bashfully burying his face into her dress. She pats his
head with pride.
Everyone APPLAUDS. The performance seems to be over. Dani
looks completely disoriented.
Connie turns to Siv.
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56A CONTINUED: 56A
CONNIE
So, is this just like a Wiccan
thing??
SIV
(confused at first)
Wicca? Oh my dear no! This is about
reciprocity.
Connie, wild eyed, looks unsatisfied.
SIV (CONT’D)
Strictly presentational.
Dani still looks crazed. She turns to find CHRISTIAN, who (in
contrast) looks very amused.
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Scene 22 - Growing Divide
Dani has pulled Christian to a secluded spot. She is very
high-strung. In the b.g., the Hårgas’ WATER POWER PLANT is
visible.
DANI
Please Christian - we need to
leave. This is feeling really
wrong.
CHRISTIAN
Okay: look: I know it’s weird.
That’s because it’s alien. We
haven’t ever been exposed to
anything like this.
DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
No, Christian: this is pagan
nature worship. This is
completely backwards. We
shouldn’t be here. We just need to acclimate--
DANI
I don’t want to acclimate! I want to
leave.
CHRISTIAN
Baby, I cannot leave right now.
Period. I’m doing my thesis on these
guys--
DANI
What? Since when?!
CHRISTIAN
Since I decided! Today. Which you
know has been a nightmare for me to
figure out. And I made the mistake of
telling Josh and now he’s competing
with me--
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DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
So let him have it if he
wants it! We shouldn’t be No, hey - have you even seen
here, Christian. what’s happening here?! This
level of tradition? And
nobody knows about it,
nobody’s written on it - and
they’ve invited us to be part
of it! Can’t you see what a
privilege that is?!
Because Pelle did!
But why have they invited us?
Because he trusts us!
And why did Pelle?!
DANI
And why would he trust you, of all
people? You’re opportunistic
anthropology students.
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
Maybe because we’re
anthropologists. Maybe they
want someone to document Oh my God, are you blind?
this. They’re performing pagan
rituals! People are jumping
off cliffs. They depend on
nobody knowing about this!
CHRISTIAN
(stubborn)
Not necessarily.
Dani HESITATES, seeing that she’s getting nowhere.
DANI
I want to leave.
CHRISTIAN
Then you can leave. I invited you
to come, and I don’t regret that,
but I’m here for a reason.
Beat. Christian’s eyes are ice cold.
DANI
...Do you not love me anymore?
CHRISTIAN
(momentarily stunned)
What does that have to do with this?
DANI
(almost to herself)
This is the devaluation phase.
We've been in it for a long time
now. Next comes the discard.
CHRISTIAN
Oh fuck - can we maybe spare our
relationship your textbook
psychology keywords?
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59 CONTINUED: 59
DANI
No - this has been happening for a
long time! You’ve been pulling
away. And I've been in denial.
CHRISTIAN
(finished)
Oh, please - give yourself some
credit, babe. Looks to me like
you've got it all figured out.
Christian turns to walk away, but then he STOPS. He turns
back to Dani, suddenly furious.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Actually, you know what? I’m just
gonna say something. When you
casually gift me a bouquet of
impromptu flowers, all I wonder is
how and when I'm supposed to pay
that back.
DANI
(genuinely baffled)
What? What flowers?!
(suddenly remembers)
At lunch?? I grabbed those on a
whim!
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
Oh yeah? Yes!
You have no ulterior motives? What motives would I have?
On the day after your
birthday? When I didn’t get
you flowers?? Everything you
give me is like a reminder
that I didn’t get you
something!
DANI (CONT’D)
(incredulous)
Are you serious?
CHRISTIAN
Yeah, fine - see? Play the wounded
party again. You're just this self-
denying altruist and I'm a paranoid
dick. You don't have a conniving
bone in your body!
DANI
And what is it that you imagine I'm
conniving?
CHRISTIAN DANI (CONT'D)
You are, Dani! I feel like
I'm being locked into your
debt every time you do
something “just because.” I don't do anything to “keep
‘Cause it's never just you in my debt”! I’m just
because. trying to be kind to you!
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CHRISTIAN
Fine, great - so never mind. You’re
right. I’m the asshole.
DANI CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
Nobody’s the asshole! No, I clearly am! You
selflessly give me flowers
and I feel trapped. Fuck. I’m
supposed to be WORKING here!
Christian turns and STORMS away.
DANI
Oh my God. You’re gonna walk away
now??
As he leaves, she cries out:
DANI (CONT’D)
You’re just gonna leave me like
this?!
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Scene 23 - Morning Rituals and Rising Tension
People are closing the shutters, bringing the Main House into
darkness.
Dani enters with sunken eyes. Christian’s already in bed.
Staring at him, Dani walks to JOSH. (She is pulling at her neck
again.)
DANI
Do you have a sleeping pill?
JOSH
Sure. Uh...
Josh fishes a PILL out of his bag.
JOSH (CONT’D) DANI
They’re intense, though. You
might wanna cut it in half. I just need to sleep.
She swallows it whole.
61 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - “NIGHT” 61
Silence. Everyone is asleep, including Dani.
There is RUSTLING heard off-screen. Dani WAKES. She sits up
to see...
Christian’s bed is now EMPTY. So is Mark’s bed. And Josh’s.
Concerned, Dani looks to the DOOR. Mark, Josh, Pelle and
Christian are quietly tip-toeing out of the house. They
GIGGLE. Christian is the last to exit.
Confused, Dani climbs out of bed. She rushes to the door.
Dani looks OUTSIDE to see that the group is now inside the
RENTAL MINIVAN, which is IDLING off. Pelle drives, SMILING.
Christian, in the back seat, looks down at his lap, ignoring
Dani. MARK ROUNDS TO THE BACK WINDOW, SMILING GIDDILY AT DANI
as they drive away.
Dani watches this in utter horror.
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The diminishing car’s TAILPIPE belches thick black smoke.
Dani opens her mouth in anguish. An impossible amount of
BLACK SMOKE (the same color as that from the tailpipe)
escapes her lungs, FILLING the frame, and then--
We SLAM to a HARSH INSERT of the GORED FACE of the second
Elder who jumped off the cliff. He GASPS wretchedly.
We then PUNCH OUT, wider, to reveal that the dashed bodies on
the rocks are DANI’S PARENTS and her SISTER. We then CUT TO:
62 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - “NIGHT” 62
Dani is ASLEEP in bed. The last scene was a DREAM. Her
eyelids twitch as she continues to suffer the nightmare.
We pan away from Dani to reveal that MAJA, several beds over,
is AWAKE. She anxiously fingers a freshly carved RUNE STONE.
Her eyes are GLUED to Christian, who is fast asleep.
Maja climbs out of bed and tip-toes to Christian’s bed. She
crouches to SLIDE the rune stone under his mattress. She then
runs nervously back to her bed. Poking out from under her
pillow are seven different flowers.
JOSH, whom we now reveal to be awake, has been watching this.
63 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - NEXT MORNING 63
All of the beds are now empty, and morning activity is
heard outside. Dani, however, is still asleep.
63A EXT. FIRE PIT - MORNING 63A
The corpses of the elders (Ylva and Dan) are no longer
visible in the fire. Two Hårgan MEN reach underneath
the fire pit to pull out a TRAY (stationed below the
pit). This catches all of the fire’s ASHES, which fall
through small holes in the pit.
64 EXT. BOOKBINDING HOUSE - MORNING 64
In the BG, the men from the last scene carry the ash tray
over to a massive ROTVÄLTA (a fallen tree whose root system
is exposed). The earth around the rotvälta is particularly
ASHEN. The men ceremoniously scatter the ashes across the
pale, chalky ground.
We pull back from this to reveal PELLE tending to the garden.
MARK (O.S.)
Nice garden, fag!
Pelle turns to see Mark and Josh approaching. In the deep MG,
between Mark/Josh and Pelle, are two ceremonially dressed
men, surrounded by onlookers. They finish a ceremonial song
before CHOPPING a straw goat into three sections, celebrated
by silent clapping. Josh walks past it, filming it with his
phone.
Pelle SIGHS and rises. Behind him, Sven is walking in the MG,
getting in the zone for the upcoming ceremony.
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JOSH
Hey man. Any word?
PELLE JOSH (CONT'D)
They said you can do it as
long as you absolutely don’t
use names and the location is (nodding, excited)
never even hinted at and Okay. Wow. Okay.
you’ll have to sign an
agreement to that.
Josh can’t contain his glee.
PELLE
And you split it with Christian.
Because he came to me first.
JOSH
Well, that’s -- We’ll figure that
out.
Mark notices in the distance: WOMEN picking flowers. Among
them: INGA. She is laughing with her friends.
JOSH (CONT’D)
(to Pelle)
Here: can I ask you something?
MARK
I’m gonna take a leak.
Mark walks off. We see Inga noticing him as he goes. (Beyond
her, ULF - one of the straw goat choppers - has walked up to
a hole in the earth. He kneels down to lay the straw goat
head into the hole. He then sprinkles different herbs into it
and starts filling the hole back up with dirt.) Josh pulls
Maja’s RUNE BONE out of his pocket.
JOSH
I found this under Christian’s bed.
Do you know what this is?
PELLE
(looking over it)
Love rune. It casts a love spell.
CHRISTIAN has appeared in the BG, taking a few photos of Ulf
(who is now pouring lamb’s blood onto the hole). Christian
now starts toward us. As he approaches, SEVERAL ANIMALS are
led across the field (by specially dressed Hårgans) just
behind him. Josh CONCEALS the rune.
CHRISTIAN
What’s going on?
PELLE
The elders said you can do your
thesis as long as you don’t use
actual names or location.
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CHRISTIAN PELLE (CONT'D)
Holy shit. That’s incredible.
Thank you so much. You’re splitting it with
Josh.
CHRISTIAN
(as if Josh isn’t there)
I already told him that’s totally
fine with me.
Pelle notices Christian glancing over at Maja.
PELLE
I think my sister Maja has taken a
liking to you.
CHRISTIAN
Oh. Yeah. I think I noticed.
Ulf, in the BG, has now taken to praying silently (standing
upright with his eyes closed).
PELLE
(raising eyebrows)
You know, she just got her
byxmyndig.
CHRISTIAN
Ha. What’s that?
PELLE
It means -
(smiling at the silly
expression)
- “pants license”? When you turn
fifteen, you’re allowed to have
sex.
In the BG, Ulf has noticed something horrible.
BEARDED MAN (O.S.)
NEJ!!!
Christian and Pelle and Josh FREEZE. Behind them, ULF is
running toward the Rotvälta (where the recently deceased
elders’ ashes were scattered). They all turn to it...
MARK is standing behind the fallen tree, urinating. His two
juice cups are resting on top of the giant fallen tree. When
he sees Ulf, his urine stream CEASES.
ULF
VAD GÖR DU? STOPP! BORT DÄRIFRÅN!
Mark, looking stupefied, is FROZEN.
ULF (CONT’D)
Stoppa undan din vidriga kuk. Hur
vågar du!
Mark zips back up, utterly confounded. He steps out from
behind the tree, but is still standing on the ashes.
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ULF (CONT’D)
STICK FÖR FAN! STICK!
Not understanding, Mark hesitantly steps away, leaving the
ashen area.
ULF (CONT’D)
Det här är våra förfäder! Du pissar
på våra förfäder!
People have started gathering around.
MARK
What’s wrong? What did I do?
Pelle (and Christian and Josh) have run over.
PELLE
What happened?
ULF
Din lilla Amerikanska vän här, har
pissat på Rotvältan!
PELLE MARK
(gasps)
Jag är så ledsen Fader Ulf!
Han visste ju inte. What happened? What did I do?
PELLE
You were peeing on the ancestral
tree.
MARK ULF
The tree? So what? I’m sorry. “SO WHAT?!”
MARK
What?! I didn’t know!
Ulf is in a fury. He STIFLES it, but his eyes are
frighteningly wide.
PELLE
Here, Mark: let’s just...
Pelle leads Mark away. Christian joins.
MARK
What the fuck? It was a dead tree.
What’s even happening?
PELLE
All of our dead are tied to that
tree.
MARK PELLE (CONT'D)
But it’s dead. It’s a dead I know, but it’s important to
fucking tree. I didn’t us. It’s okay. We know you
realize it was special. I didn’t know. You wouldn’t pee
just had to pee. -- Well, no, on a gravestone, right?
of course not.
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Mark looks over to Ulf, who has collapsed into furious TEARS.
ARNE, a sturdy Elder, speaks soothingly to him.
Mark calms down.
MARK
Well - fuck. I am sorry. I still
don’t understand what I did... Do I
apologize?
PELLE
Apologize later.
The Pretty Brunette (Mark’s crush), named INGA, walks up.
MARK INGA
Oh shit. Hi. (to Pelle)
Säg till honom att det ordnar
sig. Han fattar inte. Jag ska
prata med Fader Ulf.
She SMILES at Mark and walks off.
PELLE
(explaining)
She said to tell you it’s okay and
that she’ll explain to him your
mistake.
MARK
(overjoyed)
Seriously? What else did she say?
Christian now sees DANI in the distance, woozily looking for
him. He walks over to her, affecting pleasantness.
CHRISTIAN DANI
Hey! (seeing him)
Oh!
CHRISTIAN
You get some good sleep?
They arrive at each other. He gives her a peck. In the BG,
the other goat-chopper is standing and silently praying.
About twenty other Hargans stand about in the distance,
staring shocked at the scene with Ulf and Mark.
DANI
What’s happening there?
CHRISTIAN
Mark’s just completely retarded.
Dani thinks to ask more, but instead:
DANI
I’m sorry about last night.
CHRISTIAN
...How you feeling?
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DANI
(pause, emotional)
I don’t want us to be fighting,
Christian.
CHRISTIAN
Well - me neither.
Christian looks like he wants to say more. Dani waits for it.
Finally, Christian thinks better of it.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Are you feeling less nervous today?
Dani pauses uncertainly at this.
HORNS bellow in the BG. The surrounding Hårgans cease
working and everyone, including Dani and Christian, look
off in the same direction.
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Scene 24 - The Sacrifice and the Comfort
CU of a COW’S HEAD being pushed through a hole in a PILLORY.
We ZOOM OUT of this to find that the pillory has additional
holes (extending beyond both sides of the cow’s), and
additional animals’ heads are being pushed through them.
We eventually zoom out wide enough to reveal that this
pillory, perched at the top of a HILL, has secured the heads
of NINE ANIMALS (one sheep, two goats, two dogs, a baby
horse, a cow, and two pigs).
Sven stands to the side of the line-up. On the other side are
Siv, Dagny and Hanna.
The entire community has congregated at the bottom of the
hill. Dani looks very nervous. She turns to Pelle, who
already looks concerned for her.
DANI
I don’t want to be here, right?
PELLE
(brief pause)
Yes. You don’t want to be here.
Dani looks to Christian. He looks very excited. She turns
back to the top of the hill, anxious.
Siv sings one very extended note to the air. When she
finishes, SILENCE. And then...STEADY PERCUSSION BEGINS.
Sven strikes a different POSE (physically and emotionally)
with every percussive hit as Siv, Dagny and Hanna begin to
SING. As we’ve heard before, it is a WORDLESS choral song.
The rest of the congregation sings along in whispers.
Nine YOUNG MEN, each holding a blade, walk up to the animals.
Simultaneously, they all SLIT THE ANIMALS’ THROATS. The animals
THRASH wildly as BLOOD drains from their necks. (The song has
degraded into anguished snarls and cries.)
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That does it. Dani STORMS OFF. Christian is too awe-stricken
to care. Josh, meanwhile, is recording a covert VIDEO with his
phone.
Beneath each animal, a narrow CHANNEL has been pre-carved
into the earth. Each channel winds and loops to eventually
converge, thus forming THREE MASSIVE RUNIC SYMBOLS. The blood
pours from each animal to run down the separate canals. Soon,
the blood has co-mingled to fill the carefully-engineered
runic sculpture. It’s horrible and beautiful.
Josh and Christian, briefly joined in their excitement, trade
looks of amazement. Mark looks mystified.
MARK
Is this weird or is this not weird?
Pelle now goes after Dani, who is speed-walking away.
In the b.g., Simon can be heard saying:
SIMON (O.S.)
What the fuck did you bring us to?
Dani walks past SIMON, who looks very scared in the BG. He is
confronting a grinning Ingemar.
SIMON (CONT’D)
(to Ingemar, aggressively)
Why are you smiling, mate?
Dani speed-walks away from the site (with intermittent
running), going for the Main House. Pelle follows her,
glancing over his shoulder to view more of the ceremony.
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69 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - MINUTES LATER 69
Dani enters the Main House, eyes crazed. She goes to her bed
and begins hastily packing her bag. Her breathing is erratic
and she’s pulling at her neck again (as if to loosen the
skin).
Pelle enters.
PELLE
Dani?
Dani looks up, teeth chattering with anxiety.
DANI
I’m really sorry, Pelle. Thank you
for inviting me, but I really need
to go. Can someone maybe drive me?
PELLE
I did warn you this time. I know it
looks extreme, but we only do this
once every ninety years. It’s -
what’s the word--
DANI
I understand that it’s momentous.
PELLE
(that was the word)
Right! Exactly!
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DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
(snapping)
I don’t know why we’re here,
Pelle! I don’t know why you
invited us! Okay: Here: Sit down.
Please.
He sits Dani down. He plants himself beside her, taking her
hands.
PELLE (CONT’D)
I invited my friends because this is
a once-in-a-lifetime thing and I
wanted to share it. Especially with
my friends who I knew would
appreciate it, because I am proud of
this place.
DANI
But I’m not an anthropologist. I
don’t have the foundation to
understand this.
PELLE
And yet I was the most excited for
you to come.
Pelle has pulled a special homemade sachet (containing a
SPECIAL HERB) from his pocket. He places a under her nose.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Here: smell this.
DANI
What is it?
PELLE
It calms you down.
She pauses before smelling it.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Go on. Inhale. I will, too.
Demonstrating, he INHALES the herb deeply. He puts it back to
her nose, and she does the same. She’s still trembling.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Isn’t that nice?... I know what
you’re going through, Dani.
DANI PELLE (CONT'D)
What am I going through? I’m You’re going through a lot.
scared. I can’t breathe.
PELLE (CONT’D)
I know you are, and I’m going to say
something now, because my birth
parents are both gone, too--
DANI
What?!
(crying now)
That’s not what I’m talking about!
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PELLE
I know, and that’s fine, but
please... My birth-parents both died
when I was a little boy. They burned
up in a fire, and I became -
technically - an orphan. So believe
me when I say I know what that is,
because I do. Yet my difference is:
I didn’t get a chance to feel lost.
Because I had a family - here -
where everyone embraced me and swept
me up and I was raised by a
community that doesn’t bicker over
what is theirs and what is not
theirs. That’s what you were
sacrificed to. But I - have always
felt...held. By a family. A real
family. Which everyone deserves. And
you deserve.
Dani looks down at Pelle’s hands GRIPPING hers.
DANI
Christian could walk in.
PELLE
He’s what I’m talking about. And he’s
my good friend and I like him... But
do you feel HELD by him, Dani? Does he
feel like a HOME to you?
His eyes are locked intensely on Dani’s. She doesn’t turn
away.
PELLE (CONT’D)
My pilgrimage has been fun. New York
is fun... But I also find it
terrifying how people live. As if it’s
necessary and even good to be lost and
drifting...and I haven’t spent one
night over there that I haven’t longed
to be back here...in the lap of the
Hårgas.
Dani looks almost hypnotized as she looks into Pelle’s eyes.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Stay, Dani. Please. It will be
good... And I swear we’re all
finished sacrificing animals.
Dani gives a weak half-laugh. She relents. She sits up
straight and wipes her eyes, regaining composure.
PELLE (CONT’D)
Good.
Pelle stands up.
DANI
You’re a very empathic person.
PELLE
Well, our first language here is
strictly emotion-based. So I could
just be using that to manipulate
you.
Dani pauses at this. Pelle sticks his tongue out, teasing.
Dani SMILES, relieved.
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PELLE (CONT’D)
You are super vulnerable, though.
And I mean that in a great way.
It’s very rare. It’s beautiful.
Dani is touched, but tries to hide it.
DANI
(re: the herb)
Can I smell that again?
PELLE
(holding it out)
You can have it.
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Scene 25 - The Aftermath of Sacrifice
The ceremony has ended.
Simon and Connie stand frozen, traumatized. Simon is visibly
DISTRAUGHT. He stares up at the top of the HILL, where the
blood-drained animals are now being taken from the pillory.
SIMON
Are we eating those animals?
INGEMAR SIMON (CONT'D)
Not those ones. And why not?
INGEMAR
(seeing the aggression)
...Because they weren’t killed for
that.
SIMON
So what were they killed for? So we
could watch that shit and clap?
Ingemar smiles. This infuriates Simon.
SIMON (CONT’D) CONNIE
What the fuck is that smile, (trying to calm him)
mate? Get it off. Simon...
This has drawn attention. People are now looking over.
INGEMAR SIMON
(gesturing)
We can talk about this over
here. Why didn’t we talk about it
before you took us here?
Ingemar gently touches Simon’s arm to lead him away.
SIMON (CONT’D)
(pulling back his arm)
Don’t sort me out, mate!
STEN speaks up.
STEN
What’s offending you, son?
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SIMON
What’s offending me? Besides the
fact I just saw something I can’t
ever unsee, I’m offended that
you’re teaching impressionable
kids to sacrifice innocent animals
- including a fucking defenseless
dog--
IRMA speaks up.
IRMA
We sacrificed defenseless animals
yesterday, too! To fill your belly!
STEN
Why are we using “sacrifice” like
it’s a dirty word?
SIMON IRMA
Because it’s fucking Why are you swearing?! We’re
medieval! not swearing!
Sten gestures to Irma to calm down.
STEN
(to Simon)
Are you even aware you’re in your
body right now?
(then)
Sacrifice is essential in any
relationship. Let’s put it in your
terms--
SIMON
What are my terms? You don’t know
my terms--
STEN
(continuing, louder)
Say you’re entangled with a lover
who can’t put your needs before
her own.
CONNIE
What does that mean?!
STEN
(to Connie now)
Say your partner can’t part with
even a fraction of his own comfort
to give you what you need. And show
that you’re appreciated.
(to both of them now)
Wouldn’t you resent them? Wouldn’t
you start to neglect them yourself?
Maybe you’d even want to punish them
for taking you for granted.
(to Simon)
Sacrifice is proof. And without it,
I’m sorry, but no union can last.
Beat. Simon pops the bubble:
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SIMON
Alright. Thank you for that. And
now we’ve seen two people kill
themselves and nine animals get
bled to death, so I think we’re
leaving.
STEN
I’ll happily drive you to the
station.
SIMON
Lovely. Thank you.
(to Connie)
Let’s go. We’re getting our things.
STEN
(gesturing)
I do need your help jumping the
truck, if you’ll be so kind.
SIMON
You need my help specifically?
STEV
Who am I driving?
Simon pauses.
SIMON
(to Connie)
Go pack our stuff. I’ll pick you up
out front in -
(to Sten)
- five minutes?
STEN
Very fine.
Connie doesn’t want to go alone. She hesitates and then walks
quickly off. We TRACK alongside Connie, following her away.
As Connie speed-walks, PANIC rises in her. She looks back a
few times, making sure that she’s not being followed.
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Scene 26 - Simon's Departure and Christian's Indifference
She arrives at the MAIN HOUSE. Dani and Pelle are standing
outside. They watch her storm past.
DANI CONNIE
Are you okay, Connie? (not stopping)
Yeah. Sorry. We’re actually
leaving.
We stay outside with Dani and Pelle in a wide. Before long,
ODD comes running up.
ODD
Connie!
Connie steps out. She lugs her bags and Simon’s bags.
ODD (CONT’D)
Simon told me to tell you...
(catching his breath)
Jan drove him to the train station.
(MORE)
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ODD (CONT’D)
After Simon gets dropped off, he’s
sending the truck straight back for
you -
CONNIE ODD (CONT'D)
What? - and you’ll meet him there.
CONNIE
No. Why would he go without me? He
wouldn’t do that.
ODD
The truck only had room for two.
CONNIE
What does that mean? That’s not
true. Why wouldn’t he tell me?
ODD
Today’s only train leaves in ninety
minutes. It takes thirty-five
minutes to drive there and back.
They didn’t want to waste time.
CONNIE
So I could’ve sat on his lap!
ODD
Simon said that, too. Yet we don’t
break traffic laws.
Connie looks to Dani, incredulous.
CONNIE
(to Odd)
They just left without me, just
now?
ODD
There wasn’t room in the truck.
Yet it is coming right back. For
you.
Connie shakes her head, not buying it. She WALKS OFF, on a
mission to find out more. Odd turns to Dani:
ODD (CONT’D)
Lunch in a bit!
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73 EXT. FIELD - DAY 73
Mark, standing in the shadow of the kitchen-side, peers
cautiously around the corner. He’s listening to (and trying
to catch a glimpse of) ULF, who cries into the shoulder of
MATS (late 60s), a handsome elder. He’s still devastated
over the desecrated Rotvälta.
MATS
Jag vet. Det är obegripligt. Men
han förstod inte vad han gjorde.
Beyond this, Christian is interviewing VALENTIN (20s).
Christian takes NOTES as he asks questions. Two Hårga women
listen in, smiling.
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Christian’s eyes keep straying to JOSH, who is also
questioning people. They are now RACING to gather info.
CHRISTIAN
How are roles or jobs assigned?
VALENTIN
That’s based on traits we show as
kids. For example:
(points to Mats)
He was assigned “to protect,” so he
made his pilgrimage as doctor.
Christian quickly writes this down. DANI walks up to him.
CHRISTIAN
Hey. You okay?
DANI
...Simon left without Connie.
CHRISTIAN
(faux concern)
Really? That’s so shitty.
Christian bluntly returns his attention to Valentin.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
(to Happy Man)
Actually - what about coupling? Is
incest ever a problem?
Dani PAUSES, disturbed by Christian’s indifference. For the
first time, she actually looks scared of him.
VALENTIN
Ha! Well, the bloodlines are very
well preserved, so the elders must
approve mates. Cousins can
sometimes mate, but we do respect
the incest taboo, so...we often
need to invite outside peoples.
Christian is taking feverish notes. Dani watches him with a
new kind of SCRUTINY; a new kind of distrust. As Christian
writes, he GLANCES over at something, and then does a double
take (”what the hell?”). Dani also looks...
JOSH is being led to Ruben’s temple by ARNE...
Christian stares at this, wild-eyed. Dani walks disdainfully
away from him.
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Scene 27 - A Taste of the Unknown
Dani walks idly around, thinking about her exchange with
Pelle (and about Simon leaving Connie). She holds the herb
pouch that Pelle gave to her. As the gears turn in her head,
her attention falls on...
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A large KITCHEN in one of the houses. A group of WOMEN (all
ages) collaborate to prepare dinner. One woman, ULRIKA (30s),
sees Dani and waves her over. Dani pauses and then
approaches.
ULRIKA
Would you like to help join us?
DANI
Sure!
She steps up.
DANI (CONT’D)
Do you know...have you seen Simon?
ULRIKA
Oh, yes, he was driven to the
station. Did you not say goodbye?
DANI
No. I didn’t. But that’s okay...
(mind still racing)
What are we making?
ULRIKA
Meat tarts!
Dani smiles “ooh!” and joins the women. She’s handed an
apron. Another Woman says something to Dani in Swedish.
ULRIKA (CONT’D)
(translating)
Hon säger att du är så vacker.
DANI
Oh! She’s so beautiful!
Meanwhile, MAJA is preparing a tray of unbaked MEAT PIES. One
of the pies is clearly very special. She distinguishes this
one by laying a special BASIL LEAF on top.
76A EXT. FARMSTEAD - SAME TIME 76A
SIV stands among labouring men, staring at the KITCHEN
WINDOW. She watches Dani. Behind her, the maypole is being
transported from its original placement.
77 INT. TEMPLE - SAME TIME 77
The HOLY TEMPLE. Josh stands near the altar with Arne, who
has pulled the Rubi Radr from an elevated pedestal. He
shows Josh the text (written in the graphic Affect language
- a combination of runes and abstract hand paintings). The
walls of the temple are lined with thousands of books that
look like variations on the Rubi Radr.
ARNE
We describe it like “emotional sheet
music.”
JOSH
What does it say?
ARNE
Well...each runic letter stands for
one of the 16 Affects, which are
graded from most holy to most unholy.
This one is about Grief.
(MORE)
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ARNE (CONT'D)
You can see at the end, however, we
have blank pages?
Indeed the last half of the book is BLANK.
ARNE (CONT’D)
This is because the Rubi Radr is a
forever work in progress. Forever
evolving. We have many hundreds of
these.
JOSH
And who decides what’s added?
ARNE
Well - this iteration is being
written by Ruben.
Arne points to RUBEN, the deformed boy, who is playing
outside.
JOSH
(confused)
The...disabled?
ARNE
Since birth. He draws and the Elders
interpret.
He shows Josh the first pages. They are marked by HANDPRINTS -
all in different colors of paint. (Below the drawings are
illustrative interpretations.)
ARNE (CONT’D)
Ruben is unclouded by normal
cognition. It makes him open for the
source.
JOSH
So...what happens when Ruben dies? Do
you just wait until a new baby isn't
“clouded”?
ARNE
Ruben was a product of inbreeding.
All of our Oracles have been
deliberate products of inbreeding.
Josh’s jaw hangs. He hides his amazement.
JOSH
Can I possibly take a photograph?
ARNE
(suddenly alarmed)
What? No. Absolutely not.
Arne CLOSES the book.
JOSH ARNE (CONT'D)
Okay. Sorry. Absolutely not.
A TENSE beat. Broken suddenly by a very DISTANT SCREAM, too
far away to discern whether it’s made by a man or animal.
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Scene 28 - Tensions at the Fire Temple Feast
Five seconds earlier. Dani is taking pies out of the oven,
but then the same distant scream from the last scene makes
her HALT.
78 *OMITTED* 78
79 *OMITTED* 79
80 *OMITTED* 80
81 EXT. FIRE TEMPLE - EVENING 81
Five seconds earlier. Mark, who was just approaching the
triangular temple, freezes to investigate the distance
scream. It is followed by nothing.
His attention now returns to the temple, where a group of
young women are entering and exiting. The women entering
carry large floral ornaments; the ones exiting are fetching
new ornaments from a pile.
Mark keeps his distance, but continues to warily approach.
INGA emerges from the house, but when she sees him, she
pauses and hesitantly waves hello.
MARK
(to himself)
Fuck, yep, that’s her.
Embarrassed, Mark gives a half-wave, then instinctively turns
away, as if to change course.
MARK (CONT’D)
Fuck.
He then forces himself to turn back. Still looking at him,
Inga has returned to work, having picked up a big piece of
floral ornamentation. She turns her back to him as she re-
enters the temple.
Behind Mark, the young boy BROR runs from one group to
another, announcing:
BROR (O.S.)
Maten är klar! ... Det är dags för
mat!
82 EXT. FIELD - EVENING 82
The dining tables are now set in a runic pattern (symbolism
TBD). Everyone is seated.
Christian, Dani, Josh and Mark sit at a table. Pelle is
seated a few seats away. Dani glances over at him. He smiles
warmly and looks away. Dani’s eyes LINGER on him.
The SERVERS are laying plates in front of everyone. One
especially COY-LOOKING SERVER sets a plate in front of
CHRISTIAN. It features the special meat pie with the BASIL LEAF
on top.
CHRISTIAN
Thanks.
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Dani turns to Christian.
DANI
Has anyone seen Connie?
CHRISTIAN
I think Mark did earlier.
MARK
Yeah, I’m pretty sure I noticed
her trying out for the sprinting
olympics.
DANI
What? Where?
JARL, a happy Hårgan, inserts himself. (Valentin, beside him,
smiles and nods in agreement through this.)
JARL
Sorry, but I can say what happened.
Her boyfriend called the landline
from the train station and calmed
Connie down. Then she begged our
pardon and I drove her to meet him.
A brief pause as everyone considers this.
CHRISTIAN
Okay, well, that’s a relief.
DANI
Why would Simon would leave without
her?
CHRISTIAN
I’m sure it was just
miscommunication.
DANI
(after a moment)
I could see you possibly doing that.
CHRISTIAN
...The hell does that mean?
DANI
........Never mind.
Christian stares at Dani. Surprised at the uncharacteristic
defiance.
Meanwhile, Mark has noticed ULF staring at him from a
distance. Ulf has murder in his eyes.
MARK
(to Josh)
Fuck. Somebody’s still sore about
“the ancestral tree.”
Josh looks up to see Ulf, whose eyes really are trained on
Mark.
JOSH
Yikes.
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MARK
Is he gonna kill me?
Josh, preoccupied, turns to Christian. He asks, faux-
casually:
JOSH
Did you learn anything about the
Rubi Radr?
CHRISTIAN
(mock-delighted)
Oh, what? You wanna collaborate now?
Josh ignores this and moves on to his food.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
I know that one elder gave you a
glimpse.
JOSH
(abruptly, ending it)
Thank you. Sorry I brought it up.
Christian seethes. He takes a BITE of his tart. As he chews,
he catches something on his tongue, and pulls a PUBIC HAIR
from his mouth. His eyes widen with alarm.
MARK
(seeing this)
Oh my God, dude. What the fuck?
DANI
(inquiring)
What is it?
MARK DANI (CONT'D)
Was that a fucking pube? Ew.
CHRISTIAN
It’s just a hair.
MARK
Yeah. A pubic hair.
CHRISTIAN MARK (CONT'D)
(embarrassed) Why are you embarrassed?
Shhh! Calm down. They’re the ones handing out
hair pies.
Christian tenses up, embarrassed by Mark. He then notices:
MAJA is looking at him. Dani catches this.
Christian self-consciously breaks the gaze, taking a sip of
his drink (a pink-tinted MEAD in a crystal glass).
Mark notices that ULF is still staring him down.
MARK (CONT’D)
Jesus. He’s still lookin’ at me.
Josh looks tensely at his NOTES. He stares at a line that
reads: Affects -- runic combinations, “emotional sheet
music”, followed by different examples of the affect
hieroglyphics.
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INGA, the pretty brunette, sneaks up behind Mark. She
whispers in his ear.
INGA
You will come with me?
Mark turns to her, startled. He smiles widely.
MARK
What?
INGA
You will come? I show you.
MARK
Uhhh... Oh-kay.
INGA MARK (CONT'D)
Yes? Yeah. Okay. Sure. Great.
Mark rises from his seat.
MARK (CONT’D)
(to his friends)
I’ll be back, I guess? She’s gonna
show me...
Mark looks very excited as he walks off with Inga. She takes
his hand and leads him toward the woods.
DANI
Somebody for everyone, I guess.
Josh is so immersed in his thoughts, he didn’t even notice
Mark being lured away.
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Scene 29 - The Deceptive Encounter
Everybody is climbing into bed. Josh’s eyes, however, are
BUSY. He’s thinking intensely about something.
Dani sneaks up on him.
DANI
Hey, can I steal another sleeping
pill? Only half this time.
JOSH
Oh. Yeah. Okay.
Josh fetches her a pill. She takes it and moves to her bed.
Josh crawls stiffly into his bed. He’s still wearing his
SHOES.
84 INT. THE MAIN HOUSE - LATER 84
Everyone is asleep, except for JOSH, who looks as tense as
before. He sits up, scanning the room to make sure nobody is
awake. He then climbs quietly out of bed. He creeps to the
door and silently exits.
85 EXT. THE MAIN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 85
Josh rushes across the grass. It’s now darkest twilight. He
hustles to the TEMPLE, glancing nervously about.
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86 INT. RUBEN’S TEMPLE - FOYER - CONTINUOUS 86
Josh passes the dark foyer to enter through the Temple
Doors...
87 INT. RUBEN’S TEMPLE - CONTINUOUS 87
Josh sneaks into the Temple. Ruben is asleep by the door.
Josh creeps past him to approach the pedestal featuring the
holy book RUBI RADR. He pulls out his phone, turns on the
FLASHLIGHT, and begins taking silent PHOTOS - page by page -
of Rubi Radr’s text.
While he anxiously photographs, Josh keeps glancing up at the
Temple DOORS, making sure he’s still alone. He has photographed
about fifteen pages when he hears the front door CREAK open.
Josh FREEZES. He looks up. Through the Temple’s open doors, he
sees SOMEONE standing in the dark foyer. The person is barely
visible in the dimness. After some scrutiny, Josh makes it out
to be MARK. He is standing motionless.
JOSH
(relieved, whispering)
What the fuck. Mark?
But Mark doesn’t move or speak.
JOSH (CONT’D)
(whispering)
The fuck are you doing? Close the
door! We’re not supposed to be here.
Mark still doesn’t move. Despite how hard it is to see, one
can tell that his body looks BULKIER than usual. And his face
seems somewhat SWOLLEN.
Josh looks unsettled. He starts moving toward the door.
JOSH (CONT’D)
(whispering)
Mark? Hello? What the fu--?
MARK steps forward. It is now bright enough to see... This
isn’t Mark. It’s a LARGER MAN, and he’s WEARING MARK’S SKIN
(which is stretched uneasily over the man’s bulkier
features). Upon closer inspection, one might identify these
features (and the blue eyes) as belonging to ULF.
Before the full horror of this revelation can register on
Josh’s face, he is STRUCK against the HEAD by a bludgeoning
FORCE (the end of a cudgel wielded by an off-screen Hårgan).
Josh collapses to make a sustained, involuntary GROANING
noise.
A quiet moment as “Mark,” eyes invisible behind the skin
mask, stares down at Josh’s twitching body.
Josh’s body is swiftly DRAGGED out of frame.
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Scene 30 - Missing Book, Missing Boys
Outside, the ROOSTER crows.
People stir awake in their beds. Josh’s bed is EMPTY. As is
Mark’s.
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89 EXT. FARMSTEAD - MORNING 89
Breakfast time. The tables are shaped to form the
“stability” pattern. Dani, Christian and Pelle look
quizzically around. The community is dressed in more
colorful clothes than usual.
DANI
Could Mark still be off with that
girl?
PELLE
I wouldn’t be surprised.
DANI
Then what about Josh?
CHRISTIAN
I’m honestly not too concerned.
Sten stands up. A hush falls cleanly over the scene.
STEN
We have something regretful to
announce. This morning the
nineteenth book of Rubi Radr was
found missing from the temple. We
are not hoping to point fingers, yet
we ask kindly that whoever took it,
please return it to its original
place. You can leave it in the
temple, which will be left unguarded
and unwatched. Nobody need know it
was you. If it is not returned by
tonight, other actions will be
taken. Thank you.
He sits down and everyone uneasily resumes eating.
CHRISTIAN
(under his breath)
Fuck.
(to Dani and Pelle)
Which of you is surprised?
89A EXT. FARMSTEAD - LATER 89A
Breakfast has ended. Christian, Dani and Pelle deposit their
dirty dishes at the washing station, only to turn around and
see ARNE and STEN walking toward them. Our group anticipates
the following question:
ARNE
Where is your friend Josh?
CHRISTIAN
I know. We have no idea.
ARNE
He and your other friend disappear on
the same day. You see how it looks.
CHRISTIAN
Yes, obviously, but I swear to you -
we are completely in the dark on this.
We are every bit as confused as you
are.
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DANI
(not sure whether to say
it)
We did see Mark go off with one of
the girls last night.
STEN
What girl?
PELLE
Inga.
Sten thinks about this. Irma has joined. Christian
interjects:
CHRISTIAN
But Mark wouldn’t have done this.
Josh, however: he came to bed with
us, and when we woke up, he was
gone. And if he did take that book,
I just pray you understand: we do
not identify as friends of his, or
collaborators, or anything. I
certainly don't vouch for him and
we'd be so embarrassed to be
connected to this in any way.
Beat. ARNE relents.
ARNE CHRISTIAN (CONT'D)
...Let’s just hope it gets
returned. Yes. I hope that very much.
PELLE
I feel responsible.
ARNE
Well - you and Odd can go looking
for them. Maybe you can redeem this.
Pelle nods, walks to Odd, and they proceed toward the truck.
Sten turns to Dani and Christian.
STEN
(to Dani)
You’ll be going with the women for
the day’s activity.
Karin is standing behind Sten, ready to take Dani. She steps
forward to hand Dani a special summer dress.
STEN (CONT’D)
(to Christian)
And Siv asks to see you in her
house.
CHRISTIAN
(nervous)
Why?
The Elder doesn’t have the answer.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
...Which one is hers?
The Elder points to a SMALL WHITE HOUSE across the field.
Christian nods “okay” and starts toward it. As he walks, he
hears:
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PELLE (O.S.) ODD (O.S.)
Grandfather Sten! The truck is gone!
STEN (O.S.)
What?!
Christian turns to see a distraught Pelle and Odd.
ODD
They took the truck.
Pelle stares daggers at Christian, and then turns back to Odd.
Christian, very uneasy now, proceeds to the small white
house...
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Scene 31 - The Dance of Defiance
ECU of a BRIGHT YELLOW-GREEN PASTE. It’s being MASHED
vigorously in a bowl. The paste is made of ground-up flowers.
A fat SCOOP of the paste is dropped into a LARGE GLASS JUG
OF SPRING WATER (perched on a table). The paste is STIRRED
into the water.
A queue of WOMEN (between 16 and 45) has formed behind the
table. One by one, the women accept a CUP of the water. They
drink it (sometimes after nervous hesitation). In the BG is the
MAYPOLE.
Dani has joined the line. KARIN (whom she befriended
earlier) is in front of her.
DANI
Everybody knows what this is?
KARIN
Oh yes. This is the big one.
Karin smiles mischievously. Dani smiles skeptically back. They
arrive at the “water” table. Both are handed a cup.
DANI
It’s just water?
KARIN
Not just. It is for the
competition.
Karin gulps hers down, and then gestures “You now.” Dani
pauses, and then knocks it back. (Ulla and Maja watch closely
in the BG.)
KARIN (CONT’D)
(smiling)
Uh-oh!
She LAUGHS and HUGS Dani.
KARIN (CONT’D)
Here we go!
Dani looks very nervous.
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91 EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE LATER 91
Three CIRCLES OF WOMEN have formed around the Maypole. The
inside circle (of about 8 women) is surrounded by the middle
circle (about 15 women), which is surrounded by the largest,
outside circle (about 22 women).
The men, children and older women have gathered on the grass
to watch. IRMA stands with musicians (fiddler, key-harpist,
and floutist).
Dani stands in the middle circle. All the neighboring women
look very excited.
Dani looks down at the earth. At first everything looks
normal, but then she notices...GRASS has begun to sprout from
her shoes.
Dani looks up. Fuck. She’s tripping.
IRMA speaks up.
IRMA
Det var här, för länge sedan, som
den Mörke lurade Hårgas ung- dom ut
i gräset och förförde dem in i
dans. När de väl börjat kunde de
inte sluta, och de dansade sig till
döds. Nu, i livsbejakande trots mot
den Mörke, dansar vi tills vi
stupar. Hon som står ensam kvar på
slutet, kommer att krönas för sin
uthållighet.
Irma CLAPS her hands ONCE. The musicians play a long, sustained
NOTE. All of the women join hands and slowly dip to a cross-
legged BOW. The musical note dies. A brief moment of SILENCE,
and then...THE MUSIC BEGINS! (It is the song of the Hårgas.)
The women begin to DANCE. The inside circle dances in a chain
to the left. The middle circle to the right. The outside
circle to the left.
Dani stumbles as she finds her way into the dance. Once she
hits her stride, she smiles. Karin looks back at her and
LAUGHS good-naturedly. Dani laughs back!
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Scene 32 - Conflicted Loyalties
Christian sits in a small wooden chair in the empty LIVING
ROOM. The walls are completely covered in RUNIC MURAL ART.
Christian lingers on a particularly striking ILLUSTRATION
(painted in the wall’s center) in which a BEAR is being
BURNED ALIVE before several onlookers.
A door opens to reveal SIV.
SIV
Please. Come in.
Christian rises to follow Siv into the other room...
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93 INT. SMALL WHITE HOUSE - LARGER ROOM - SIV’S HOUSE - 93
CONTINUOUS
A spare room. Two stools in the center. Siv takes a seat in
one of them. It becomes clear that Christian is also to sit.
He obliges.
Siv’s posture is perfect. Christian self-consciously corrects
his posture. A long silence, and then:
CHRISTIAN
I just need to say, I have no idea
where Josh went, and I can swear to
that on my mother’s life.
SIV
How do you feel about Maja?
Christian pauses. Siv is stone. She gives him nothing.
CHRISTIAN
About Maja?
Siv just waits.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
How do I feel about her how?
SIV
You have been approved to mate with
her. You’re an ideal astrological
match and she has fixed her hopes
on you.
CHRISTIAN
We haven’t even really spoken.
SIV
She fixed on you before you came.
Pelle showed her a photo.
CHRISTIAN
(pause)
I have someone here with me. I’m
with Dani.
SIV
Dani will not know. I am not
proposing marriage. You wouldn’t be
approved for that.
CHRISTIAN
So...you’re asking me to what?
SIV
I’m asking you if you care to mate
with Maja. It is a one-night offer.
CHRISTIAN
...She’s very beautiful.
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Pause.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
I think I ate one of her pubic
hairs.
SIV
That sounds probably right.
Beat. Christian doesn’t know what to say.
SIV (CONT’D)
From an academic perspective, it
would also provide a unique glimpse
into our sexual rites.
CHRISTIAN
Can I not have a unique glimpse
without participating?
Siv smiles at the silly question.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
Can I think about it?
SIV
You can think about it right here.
Tonight is the time of alignment.
Then it’s done.
A long, conflicted pause.
CHRISTIAN
I don’t think I can.
SIV
(pause)
Is that your answer?
Christian hesitates. He’s very torn.
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Scene 33 - Maypole Mayhem
Christian emerges from the house in a daze. We track back with
him. His eyes are fraught as he wrestles with the moral
quandary. But as he continues to walk/think, a vague SMILE
sneaks onto his face.
Christian looks ahead to see the DANCE COMPETITION in the
distance. He’s walking toward it.
95 EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE - SAME TIME 95
Dani is still engaged in dance, although it’s now the tree-
penis dance. It’s a dizzying spectacle, and the mounting
hallucinations are clearly taking their toll on the dancers.
The music STOPS abruptly, and everyone FREEZES.
IRMA
Vänd!
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Everybody runs to find new positions. Karin pulls Dani to a
new spot. The music now RESUMES and they all begin a new
dance, WEAVING IN AND OUT.
One woman STUMBLES to her knees, laughing. She is now
disqualified. She walks off to sit on the grass and watch.
Another WOMAN pulls out of the circle to RETCH nearby. She is
also disqualified.
Dani, who was having fun, is suddenly disturbed by the
retching sound. She feels sick for a second.
DANI
(thoughts turning)
Josh...?
Karin turns happily to Dani.
KARIN
Don’t slip!
Dani looks to her.
KARIN (CONT’D)
Can you holding on?!
Dani gets a second wind. She’s back.
Maja, who is dancing in the outside circle, sees CHRISTIAN
arriving. He joins the onlookers.
Maja decisively feigns COLLAPSE, opting out of the dance. She
stumbles over to the onlookers, affecting dizziness. She
glances over at Christian, smiling at him. He SMILES back. She
coyly sits a few people over. The electricity between them is
palpable.
The music STOPS abruptly again. All the dancers turn around,
switching hands. As the music starts again, one woman TOPPLES
to her side, bringing down two of her neighbors. She and one
other laugh; the third woman is furious.
95A EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE - LATER 95A
Many of the women have now been disqualified. Dani is still
in the running! She seems determined to stay alert and
compete. There are TEN remaining women; five run in one
direction and the other five run in the opposite direction,
weaving around each other.
Irma opens her arms swiftly and the musicians CEASE playing.
The dancing women STOP, and two of them collide. They fall to
the ground.
IRMA
Åtta!
The onlookers CLAP SILENTLY.
Karin turns to Dani, gives her a big HUG and KISSES HER ON
THE LIPS. Dani, startled, turns self-consciously to the
“clapping” onlookers. She sees CHRISTIAN. He isn’t paying
attention. Feeling Dani’s gaze, his eyes go to her. She
stares blankly. Taken aback, he gives her a SMILE. She
doesn’t smile back. She’s very much in the grip of the
psychedelics now.
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Dani’s HANDS are taken by women on either side of her. The
music STARTS and they commence dancing.
95B OMITTED 95B
95C EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE - MEANWHILE 95C
Christian sits among the onlookers. He is chilled by his
last encounter with Dani. Suddenly, he notices ULLA
(whom he met earlier) walking toward him. She arrives at
his feet, holding out the CUP of the flower-spiked
water.
ULLA
For you.
CHRISTIAN
What is it?
ULLA
Spring water with special
properties.
CHRISTIAN
(skeptical)
What’s it do?
ULLA
Breaks down your defenses and opens
you for the influence.
CHRISTIAN
...I’m worried I’ll have a bad
trip.
Christian looks back to Maja. She’s now looking directly at
him. Her eyes are languid, confident. She doesn’t break the
gaze.
Christian turns to Ulla, and accepts the water. He sips it.
Sips it again. KNOCKS it back.
Settling into the idea that he’s now going to hallucinate,
Christian looks back to the MAYPOLE. The women are still
dancing in a circle.
95D EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE - IN THE DANCING CIRCLE 95D
Dani’s eyes betray rising panic.
One woman (MAJVOR) says, as provocation:
MAJVOR
Om vi stannar nu, kommer allt
fortsätta snurra (runt)?
ULRIKA, the small woman we met earlier, replies:
ULRIKA
(laughing)
Tänk om vi skulle titta ner och det
var tusenfotingar överallt?
Ulrika laughs, and then looks down. As imagined, she sees the
ground as a squirming BLANKET OF CENTIPEDES. She SCREAMS in
horror, desperately FLEEING the circle.
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95D CONTINUED: 95D
Another woman has looked down to see the same thing. She also
SCREAMS, and runs off.
Dani looks down, panicked and confused. It’s just the earth
beneath her feet.
DANI
There’s nothing there.
Dani looks up. She laughs with relief, still confused.
KARIN
(smiling)
That’s right! Hold on to your
brain!
CUT HARD TO:
95Da INSERT: INGA’S FACE SLAMMING INTO POLE AFTER RUSHING TOWARD 95Da
IT WITH ASCENDING ARMS.
INSERT: WOMAN SPRAYING VOMIT INTO THE AIR.
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Scene 34 - Dani's Coronation
Now, only Dani and two other women are in the running. One of
these is Karin. The other is a good-natured brunette. They
each dance separately, no longer holding hands. The
brunette’s legs are clearly less stable than Dani’s or
Karin’s, and she is tired and stumbling.
Competition has been growing in Dani. She’s so close to
winning that she can now taste it.
Karin turns happily to Dani.
KARIN
Är du trött?
Dani, still dancing:
DANI
I don’t speak Swedish!
KARIN
(not understanding)
What?!
Dani repeats herself, but it comes out as:
DANI
Aewobeemeewish!
Karin, understanding, responds:
KARIN
Waweroobeeny!
DANI
(somehow understanding)
Aewabeeny-sa-aewonnerstabloo!
They are speaking complete gibberish, but they understand
each other perfectly. Dani is amazed.
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DANI (CONT’D)
(excitedly remarking on
this)
Weerabbleeishcobleraymib!
Karin nods manically, agreeing with this.
KARIN
Blorishcobleraymib-wonnerstablee!
The Plump Woman suddenly TRIPS over one foot to fall CRASHING
to the ground. Karin (still facing Dani) TRIPS over the Plump
Woman. She COLLAPSES, laughing merrily on the way down.
Dani dances past the fallen women. She doesn’t immediately
realize that she’s just won the competition. She still looks
determined as she continues dancing manically around the
maypole.
95F EXT. FIELD - MAYPOLE - MINUTES LATER 95F
Cheering women rush over to congratulate Dani, but she
KEEPS DANCING in the circle, afraid that it’s a trick.
The women tug excitedly at Dani’s arms. They embrace her.
Dani decelerates, but does not cease dancing. Finally,
enough women have enfolded her. Her dancing feet slow to a
confused halt.
IRMA
Vi har (fått) vår Majdrottning!!
IRMA approaches with an immense, gorgeously crafted GARLAND
CROWN. She lays it on Dani’s head.
DANI
(hallucinating)
It’s over?
IRMA
You are our May Queen.
DANI
(confused)
Why? Me?
IRMA
You!
DANI
(suddenly scared)
What do you mean?!
ROSE PETALS are thrown by children. *
Dani, severely disoriented, is led aside by several women.
One woman wraps her in a sort of gown (composed only of
greenery and flora), and then she is directed to stand before
a gorgeous view of the field. Her distracted attention is
pointed to a MAN holding a large, old FILM CAMERA. He takes
Dani’s PHOTOGRAPH.
Dani looks for Christian, who stands among the Hårgans with a
baffled expression. Dani alights on him.
DANI (CONT’D)
What’s happening?!
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But Christian doesn’t understand it himself. He shakes his
head to say “I don’t know!”
DANI (CONT’D)
(pleadingly, to the
surrounding women)
What does this mean? What do I have
to do?
The women answer with hugs, warm smiles, and kisses on the
cheek. Their faces morph subtly (a product of the
psychedelics). Among the people who kiss her are her MOTHER
and FATHER and SISTER (Terri). She looks back for them, but
they have disappeared. A figment of her imagination?
Caught in the hallucination, Dani falls into a traumatized
daze. PELLE breaks the spell by giving Dani an enthusiastic
hug.
PELLE
Holy cow, you won! May Queen!
He gives her a blunt, passionate KISS on the lips. Before she
can react, Pelle is replaced by two new women, also kissing
and hugging her.
Dani is then led to a ROUND WOODEN PLANK (painted gold and
shaped like a cartoon SUN) with six long, protruding handles.
She is directed to STAND on it.
KARIN
Careful!
The handles are gripped by six men, and Dani is swiftly
HOISTED UP. She almost falls, but doesn’t. She is elevated
five feet above the ground as the crowd erupts into mirthful
SONG.
The song persists as Dani, still on her pedestal, is carried
across the field. All eyes are on her. Everyone follows her.
DANI
(searching)
Christian?!
But Christian has lagged to the back of the crowd. He looks
extremely conflicted. His eyes move to Maja, whose eyes are
TRAINED on him. She smiles widely, but her eyes are faded.
Christian slows to a stop as the procession continues.
Meanwhile, Dani’s confusion and fear is beginning to subside.
She looks down at the procession to see that these people are
indeed celebrating her. A few women even persist in throwing
rose petals up at her.
Dani, now calm, looks down to see that her FEET and LEGS have
assumed the GOLD color of the plank (like a chameleon).
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Scene 35 - A Throne of Uncertainties
The crowd arrives at today’s DINING AREA. In a LUSH
FIELD, the tabletops are made of MIRRORS, and they are
all queued up to form a long, straight line. At the
head of the table is a HUGE CHAIR (more like a throne)
adorned in lush greenery and bright flora.
Dani’s pedestal is set down. Members of the crowd step aside
to create a PATH for Dani’s trajectory (toward the throne).
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Dani takes a moment before stepping decisively onto the
GRASS.
When Dani’s FOOT touches the grass, small SUMMER FLOWERS
magically SPROUT UP around her foot. Her next step is the same.
Flowers emerge, impossibly, from the soil. She continues to walk
forward, having now assumed a more self-possessed posture.
Confidence is rising in her, and with every step, more flowers
sprout up. She’s leaving a beautiful trail of wild flowers in
her wake.
Dani STOPS at the throne. Everyone now finds their way to their
seats, but no one sits. They look to her. She looks momentarily
confused, but then understands. She SITS. Now everyone may sit.
Dani admires her green throne. The greenery/flora subtly
SWELLS and DEFLATES (as we saw before, with the mushroom
trip).
SERVERS appear with plates. Dani is the first person to
receive food and drink. Her tableware is much finer than the
rest.
Looking down at her food, Dani suddenly catches her
reflection in the tabletop mirror. Her face looks wrong. She
quickly LOOKS AWAY.
Before long, everyone has food in front of them. They sit
with their hands on their laps, present. They WAIT for Dani.
Dani picks up her FORK. She looks back to the rest of the
table. They all look back at her with patience. She then
looks down and PIERCES her food with the fork. (The sound of
the piercing is heightened.) Dani takes a BITE. Now everyone
may begin eating.
Dani looks down the length of the extended table. She alights
on CHRISTIAN, who isn’t eating. He looks very disturbed,
clearly suffering a bad trip. He looks in Dani’s direction.
They LOCK EYES, but communicate nothing to each other. They
are both lost in confusion, but they don’t share in this. If
anything, they look SCARED of each other.
This moment is broken by a SERVER arriving at Dani’s side. He
presents her with a SALT HERRING. The community sees this and
laughs, knowing what’s in store.
DANI
For what?
STEN explains:
STEN
You must eat it whole, but the tail
going first.
DANI
(sincerely frightened)
What? I can’t. That’s too big.
STEN
(chuckle)
No no - you must try.
Christian, tripping heavily, turns to a LARGE MAN to his
side.
CHRISTIAN
How much is happening right now?
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Inexplicably, the Large Man CLAPS in Christian’s face. This
sends Christian on an intense downward spiral.
CHRISTIAN (CONT’D)
(almost inaudible)
Why did you do that?
The Large Man’s attention is now on Dani, whose head is
tilted back as she tries to eat the herring whole (tail
first). Sten holds it above her, feeding it into her mouth.
Dani takes half of the herring into her mouth, starts to
chew, and then coughs out the rest. This elicits ecstatic
APPLAUSE. Dani, unnerved at first, lets out a childlike
LAUGH.
STEN
A word from the May Queen!
BLONDE WOMAN DIFFERENT HARGANS
Yes! Speech! Speech!
IRMA
Stand! Stand!
Dani is urged to stand up. She does so, clearly hallucinating
intensely. The silence hangs heavily.
DANI
...I don’t know if this is real, or
what’s happening, but - thank you.
Dani lets this hang. A brief awkward pause, and then:
ARNE
To the May Queen!
(raises his aquavit)
Skål!!
EVERYONE
Skål!!
Everyone drinks to that. One Hårgan Woman turns to Dani
(who’s sitting back down) to excitedly say:
HÅRGAN WOMAN
You are the family now! Yes?
Dani nods, unsure. The woman nods manically.
HÅRGAN WOMAN (CONT’D)
Yes! Yes! You are the family!
The Woman rubs Dani’s arm, smiling warmly (and aggressively).
PELLE, we reveal, is composing a drawing of Dani in her throne.
Christian’s expression is SOUR. He turns to notice that MAJA is
looking at him. Taken aback, Christian’s expression slowly
SOFTENS (in a slack-jawed, lust-stricken way). Maja is clearly
“in heat.” Holding Christian’s gaze, she RISES from her seat (as
if in slow-motion) and begins to walk sensually off. Christian
watches her go. She passes SIV, whose eyes are also trained on
Christian.
Maja continues toward the TEMPLE, glancing back at Christian
to confirm that he’s still watching her. DANI notices this,
despite the fact that everyone is competing for her
attention.
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Dani looks to Christian. He stares dumbly at the table, lost in
conflict.
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Scene 36 - The May Queen's Departure
Everyone is finished (although there’s a smaller number of
women at the table now). Siv RISES. All eyes go respectfully
to her.
SIV
Now it is traditional for the May
Queen to bless our crops and
livestock. And after the luck you
just inherited from that salt
herring, we should all be doubly
encouraged.
Laughter all around.
Siv gestures in the direction of a CARRIAGE, just beyond the
tables. Its back sports TWO UNLIT TORCHES. Several girls (six *
to pull the carriage and six to accompany it) surround it. *
One GIRL scatters flowers to create a PATH between Dani and *
the carriage. Dani RISES. Everyone else stands up, too.
DANI
Can Christian come with me?
SIV
No. The Queen must ride alone.
Dani pauses to accept this. She steps onto the floral path and
approaches the carriage. On the way, Hanna offers her a LONG, *
FLAMING STICK. Dani accepts it. Hanna motions to the carriage’s *
unlit torches.
Dani walks to the carriage, extends the stick’s flame toward
the torches, and sets them each AFIRE.
Hanna takes the stick back from Dani, and gestures for her to *
enter the carriage. A TRADITIONALLY DRESSED MAN stands beside
the carriage door. He hands Dani a VIAL OF HOLY SPRING WATER,
and offers Dani his hand (for support) as she contemplates
entering.
TRADITIONALLY DRESSED MAN
Your majesty.
Dani accepts his supportive hand as she climbs into the
carriage.
96 INT. CARRIAGE - CONTINUOUS 96
Dani takes a seat.
Outside, several YOUNG WOMEN (including HANNA) have gathered
in front of the carriage. They each take hold of RODS,
prepared to pull the carriage.
A few other women have gathered to the sides of the carriage.
Two - one on either side - hold juniper boughs and unlit *
torches. They IGNITE their torches by the fire of the *
carriage torches. *
97 EXT. DINING AREA - SAME TIME 97
Most of the community remains standing at the dining tables.
They WATCH as the women pull the carriage away.
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Christian watches, too. Guilt-ridden. He then looks to the *
temple. A GIRL has begun scattering flowers to create a NEW *
PATH. This is between Christian and the TEMPLE. *
98 INT. CARRIAGE (MOVING) - MOMENTS LATER 98
Dani looks out the window as the carriage is pulled through
the WHEAT FIELDS. The accompanying women WAVE their torches
about and cast away dark spirits. *
99 EXT. FIELD - SAME TIME 99
The girl finishes the flower path, ending at Christian’s *
feet. All eyes are now on him. *
Christian, frozen for a moment, RISES. He takes one abrupt
step forward, and then continues warily toward the Temple.
100 INT. TEMPLE - CONTINUOUS 100
Christian enters the foyer of the temple. The temple doors
are closed and muffled humming is heard from within. MATS, *
dressed in ceremonial dress, stands in waiting. He hands
Christian a WHITE GOWN.
MATS
Put this.
The man gestures to a MODESTY PANEL in the corner (behind
which Christian can disrobe). *
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Scene 37 - Rituals of the Unseen
The women pulling the carriage have slowed to a STOP. Dani
is directed by Hanna to step out. Hanna holds the flaming *
torch over a small HOLE in the ground. Dani is instructed *
to hold the torch by its handle (just above where Hanna *
grips it). Hanna now affects perfect posture. Dani *
instinctively mimics this. *
Three women - each holding a sack of GRAIN, a raw STEAK, and *
an EGG - approach the hole. One pours grain into the hole, *
the other drops the steak over the grain, and the last woman *
cracks the egg into it. The hole is then COVERED UP with *
soil. *
HANNA
Repeat now after me.
Dani and Hanna are looking directly into each other’s eyes.
Hanna begins to SING very slowly, enunciating very carefully,
and Dani SINGS ALONG (quite well). They circle the hole with *
the torch held in the center. The surrounding women dance. *
102 INT. TEMPLE - FOYER - SAME TIME 102
Christian has changed into the WHITE GOWN. He steps nervously
out from behind the modesty panel.
CHRISTIAN
What now?
Mats now turns to a MAN WITH HAIR COVERING HIS FACE (looking
like the back of a head). He hands Mats a STONE POT. Mats now
turns to raise the pot toward Christian’s face. Christian
looks very unnerved by the man whose face is covered in hair.
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MATS
Breathe in.
Mats lifts off the lid to release a WAVE OF STEAM. Christian
looks to Mats, wary.
MATS (CONT’D)
For your vitality.
Reluctantly, Christian BREATHES IN the vapors and his eyes
begin to cloud over. He EXHALES heavily (coughing the last
bit out). He’s already feeling the effects. His breathing
becomes shallow and his legs start to wobble.
The Man Whose Hair Envelops His Face now OPENS THE DOORS to
the temple. Quiet humming is heard from inside.
103 INT. TEMPLE - CONTINUOUS 103
It is dark, save for several burning candles.
In the center of the room, lying on a lush bed of freshly cut
birch twigs and WILD FLOWERS, is MAJA. She is NUDE, lying on
her back, legs together.
Several OLDER WOMEN, mostly in their 30s and 40s (some in
their 50s and 60s), stand at the back of the room. They are
also NUDE. The humming comes from them.
Christian is too stoned to react. He regards the room as he
would a dreamscape.
The humming starts to build as the women SING in the Hårgas’
wordless, groaning, microtonal tradition.
Maja tilts her head and her eyes move toward the front
door...at Christian.
One Woman now steps up to draw Christian’s gown OFF of his
shoulders. He is fluidly DISROBED. Now standing naked, he is
directed towards Maja, who waits nervously.
Christian seems to LEVITATE six inches off the ground and
then FLOATS gently across the room (clearly a product of the
escalating hallucination). As he approaches Maja, the
singing intensifies. Maja’s LEGS timidly PART. Christian,
approaching swiftly, looks down at her. Her eyes are closed
as she waits to be taken. The singing rises to an operatic
pitch.
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Scene 38 - Twilight Descent
The sun is less intense now. It is nearing twilight.
The carriage rests near the barn. Dani, holding a torch, *
proceeds to bless the livestock. Hanna sings.
105 INT. TEMPLE - SAME TIME 105
Christian has descended to his knees. He sits between Maja’s
legs, preparing himself. He looks extremely intoxicated.
Maja’s eyes are squeezed shut as she anticipates what’s coming.
Christian awkwardly leans down to gently KISS her lips. Without
opening her eyes, she kisses back - slowly, sensually. The
singing rises and falls (out of harmony) with trembling
impatience.
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Christian gently presses himself into Maja. Her mouth opens
in anticipation. He ENTERS her. Overwhelmed, Maja digs her
nails into his back. Her eyes well with tears. Christian
looks unsettled, but he continues...
Christian is now MAKING LOVE to Maja, very slowly - almost
robotically. She lies motionless, mouth agape. She doesn’t
move a muscle, nor does she make a sound, but her expression
is one of total, paralyzed ECSTASY. The singing has now
HARMONIZED.
The Older Women watch this with rapt attention. They are clearly
aroused. The lovemaking is dreamily slow. The singing rises
steadily. Delayed percussion accompanies each heavy, lagging
THRUST.
Maja looks back at one of the women. It is ULRIKA. She smiles
tenderly at her. This would be touching if it weren’t so
weird. Maja offers Ulrika her HAND, and Ulrika supportively
takes it into her hands. Ulrika lovingly presses her CHEEK
against Maja’s open palm, CARESSING her face.
Maja MOANS. The women all MOAN in sympathy. (They have taken *
to rubbing their breasts.)
In the far corner, we reveal, Ruben is finger-painting on the
pages of the Rubi Radr. He is inspired.
106 EXT. FARMSTEAD - MOMENTS LATER 106
The carriage has returned to the farmstead. Dani steps uneasily
out of the wagon, still under the warping influence of the
hallucinogen. The SINGING/MOANING is heard faintly from the
Temple.
HANNA
We shall go now to Siv’s house.
DANI
What’s there?
HANNA
It is a special meeting, only for
the Queens. She will bless you.
The distant singing persists. Dani looks to the Temple. She
seems DRAWN to it.
DANI
What about there?
HANNA
Not for us.
Dani, attracted/worried by the singing/moaning, takes a few
steps toward the Temple. The young women look very
concerned. Hanna steps up to STAND IN DANI’S WAY.
HANNA (CONT’D)
I think you should not.
DANI
...Why?
Hanna is not convincing when she says:
HANNA
It is a ceremony for the men.
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Dani is now very suspicious. Her expression begs “What is it
really?” Hanna’s expression says that it’s something that
would hurt Dani. Hanna’s expression pleads: “Don’t go inside.
For your own sake.”
Dani’s eyes NARROW with paranoia. Now she must enter. She
PUSHES ahead. The women remain where they are, very worried.
107 INT. TEMPLE - FOYER - CONTINUOUS 107
Dani enters the foyer of the temple. Beyond the closed doors,
the singing/moaning has reached an operatic intensity.
Dani takes a moment to gather herself, and then she bends
down to peer through the door’s KEYHOLE.
Through the keyhole, Dani sees Christian’s BACK as he “makes
love” to Maja. The surrounding women have fallen deeper into
their trance. They are all HOLDING THEIR BREASTS. With every
one of Christian’s thrusts, the women PUMP THEIR BREASTS WITH
THEIR HANDS - moaning in tandem with Maya. Dani’s eyes go
WIDE with horror.
Stunned, Dani backs away from the keyhole. She suddenly
doubles over and RETCHES. She rushes out of the temple.
108 EXT. TEMPLE - CONTINUOUS 108
Dani runs outside. She VOMITS onto the grass. She’s in a
state of shock. Her breathing is shallow and she looks
anxiously around, as if confused as to her whereabouts.
The young women rush over to Dani. They surround her,
touching her, rubbing her. Dani CAN’T BREATHE. She’s
panicking.
Hanna directs the women to LEAD Dani to the Main House. They
all hurriedly guide her in that direction.
109 INT. MAIN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 109
The young women usher Dani to her bed. They sit her down,
gathering intimately around her. Dani struggles increasingly
to breathe.
Hanna HOLDS Dani’s FACE in her hands. She locks eyes with
Dani and affects DEEP BREATHING. Dani’s eyes, unwilling to
settle at first, gradually become FIXED to Hanna’s. Hanna
continues to affect deep, measured breathing. Dani struggles
to follow her. Her breathing trembles to meet Hanna’s
example.
Finally, Dani BREAKS DOWN into tears. Everything she’s
bottled up, all the emotions that she’s labored to stifle -
it all comes BURSTING out. She falls into deep, anguished
SOBS.
Still locked onto Dani’s gaze, Hanna also breaks down. She
SOBS DEEPLY along with Dani. They are sympathetically
connected. It’s remarkable, and very unsettling.
The surrounding women have also started CRYING, although not
as intensely as Hanna, who has absolutely fixed herself to
Dani. The crying is infectious, and the deeper they go, the
greater the outpour.
It has become a circle of hysterical, weeping women. They
moan and scream and cry. It’s positively TRIBAL.
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The ceremony has nearly reached its apogee. The singing has
peaked, and Christian is thrusting faster and harder than
before. Maja, eyes still closed, is in a state of absolute
EUPHORIA. She moans in ecstasy, and the room has filled with
a cacophony of sympathetic moans.
Christian suddenly looks ill. He begins to slow down.
MAJA
(in Swedish)
No. Don’t stop.
Christian looks like he’s going to be sick.
One of the OLD WOMEN (60s) crouches behind Christian. She
PUSHES on his buttocks, urging him to thrust faster. She keeps
pushing and pushing until Christian’s thrusts have gained in
force.
MAJA (CONT’D)
(in Swedish)
Yes. Yes. Fill me.
Christian continues to push until he finally CLIMAXES. The
Old Woman releases him, and backs away.
The singing/moaning DIES out.
Christian, motionless for a long moment, pulls out of Maja
and sits on the ground. He looks slightly traumatized. Maja
looks as euphoric as ever. She hugs her knees to her chest,
and gently rocks herself back and forth.
MAJA (CONT’D)
(in Swedish, to the women)
I can feel it! I feel the baby!
Christian looks back to the OLD WOMAN who was just pushing his
buttocks. She smiles toothlessly at him. He’s definitely going
to be sick. He STANDS suddenly, taking in the room with
growing repulsion. He turns to amble dizzily out of the
temple.
111 EXT. TEMPLE - BOOK BINDING - CHICKEN COOP - CONTINUOUS 111
Christian exits the temple. He looks around, increasingly
disoriented. He looks down to see the fresh puddle of Dani’s
VOMIT. This triggers him to retch. He moves desperately away
from the vomit.
Standing at a distance, several isolated Hårgans watch
Christian stumbling about. Christian tries to ignore them. He
walks toward the MAIN HOUSE, but as he approaches, he hears
the CHORUS OF CRYING (coming from Dani and the young women),
and he immediately changes his trajectory.
Christian is now walking toward the BOOK BINDING HOUSE.
As he nears the house, he sees that the TRUCK (which was
supposedly stolen) is now parked beside it. Christian’s eyes
buzz with suspicion.
He then looks downward...at a GARDEN in front of the book
binding house. It is in the shape of a CIRCLE. And at the
heart of that circle...a FOOT, its sole facing skyward,
protrudes from the soil. A symbol has been painted onto the
sole. (It is Josh’s foot.)
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Christian’s eyes are wild with terror. He rigidly turns
around, his heart pounding, panic taking hold.
CHRISTIAN
(to himself, in denial)
That’s not that. That wasn’t...
He walks off hurriedly toward a SMALL HOUSE. He opens the
door to reveal that it’s a CHICKEN COOP.
112 INT. CHICKEN COOP - CONTINUOUS 112
Christian enters. He shuts the door behind him. Chickens flap
stupidly about.
Christian tries to regain his composure. But as he tries to
steady his breath, he SEES...
Across the room, SIMON - naked - is suspended midair. His
arms are outstretched, his body faced downwards, and it
looks like he’s flying. (In fact, he’s being held up by
flora-decorated ropes.) His BACK HAS BEEN OPENED UP, his
RIBS SEPARATED FROM HIS SPINE (reaching outward like claws)
and his LUNGS HAVE BEEN PULLED UP TO LOOK LIKE OUTSPREAD
WINGS. It appears that his bloody “wings” have also been
covered in bird feed. In fact, one chicken is currently
standing on his back, pecking at a rib.
Frozen in horror, Christian stares unblinkingly.
CHRISTIAN
Josh?
Christian’s eyes fill intensely with TEARS. He starts toward
Simon, whose lung-wings are subtly SWELLING and DEFLATING.
He’s still breathing.
Driven by morbid compulsion, Christian crouches under Simon
to make sure that it’s Simon’s face, and he confirms that it
is, BUT...
His EYES HAVE BEEN REMOVED and the sockets have been stuffed
with BRILLIANTLY COLORED FLOWERS.
Terrified, Christian turns - as if to run from this nightmare
- but he SLAMS into...
ODD, who is wearing a garland crown. Odd blows a handful of
BROWN POWDER in Christian’s face. Christian can’t help but
BREATHE IT IN. He coughs out a lungful of the mysterious
dust.
Stunned for a moment, Christian stumbles back. He tries to
move his legs, but they are suddenly FROZEN. Now immobile,
Christian drunkenly COLLAPSES. He writhes into panic, unable
to move. His eyes are LOCKED OPEN.
He sees a gathering of Hårgans outside the door. Among them
is PELLE. Christian looks pleadingly at Pelle. Pelle looks
away with shame.
Odd leans down. With his fingers, he CLOSES one of
Christian’s EYELIDS. He then CLOSES the other. As this lid
shuts, we GO TO BLACK.
HOLD ON BLACK. After a beat, we sharply cut to:
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A TIGHT CLOSE-UP of Christian’s sleeping face. His lip is
slightly contorted, and his chin is chapped with dried
saliva. A HAND enters frame to gently SLAP Christian awake.
His eyelids do not open on their own.
The hand’s fingers PRY OPEN Christian’s EYELIDS. His lip
remains contorted. He tries to speak, but it’s nothing but
vowels.
ULLA (O.C.) *
You cannot speak. You cannot move.
We cut WIDE to reveal that Christian sits limply in a
wheelchair. He faces the crowd. Behind him, on the stage, is
an immense THRONE made of glorious flowers. DANI sits in this
throne, dressed in a MASSIVE FLORAL DRESS that looks like a
grossly distended pile of blossoming flowers. Her GIANT
FLORAL GARLAND CROWN is comprised of the nine special flowers
and herbs. To either side of her, the ELDERS are all standing
upright. (Also, RUBEN has a special seat, whose platform is
covered in COTTON, resembling CLOUDS.)
Dani seems to have detached from reality completely. Her eyes
are somewhere far away.
The entire community is gathered behind Christian. Among
them, MAJA stands happily, wearing vivid red lipstick.
When it’s clear that she has everyone’s total attention, SIV
SPEAKS:
SIV
On this, the day of our deity of
purification, we gather to give
special thanks to our treasured Sun.
As an offering to our Father, we
will today surrender nine human
lives.
Christian’s eyes flare with terror. Dani’s expression is
blank.
SIV (CONT’D)
As Hårga takes, so Hårga also
gives. Thus, for every newblood
sacrificed, we will dedicate one
of our own. That is: four
newbloods, four Hårgans, and one
to be chosen by our Queen. Nine in
all, to die and be reborn in the
great Cycle.
Siv is done. Sten now continues the speech.
STEN
The four newbloods have already
been supplied. As for our end, we
have two already dedicated -
Sten gestures to two elderly CORPSES (one male and one
female) proudly DISPLAYED near the back of the crowd. They
stand upright, and their bottom halves (legs, hips) have been
replaced by TREE STUMPS and their arms have been replaced by
dense TREE BRANCHES. Their branch-arms are positioned to
strike symbolic poses. The female’s head is tilted back as
GNARLED TWIGS jut violently from her mouth (as if they grew
out of her stomach).
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The top of the male’s head is opened up (as if having
bloomed) with an overgrowth of twigs sprouted out (as if they
had grown in his brain and then broken through); twigs also
emerge from his ears.
STEN (CONT’D)
- and two who have volunteered.
(projecting to the crowd)
Ingemar? Ulf?
INGEMAR and ULF take one step forward. Ulf looks nervous.
Ingemar looks overjoyed.
STEN (CONT’D)
You have brought outside offerings,
thus volunteering your own bodies.
You will today be joined in harmony
with Everything.
(to Pelle)
And to Pelle, who has brought us new
blood and our new Queen: you are
today honored for your unclouded
intuition.
Pelle, wearing a VERY LARGE GARLAND CROWN, smiles serenely.
Sten continues:
STEN (CONT’D)
And now, for the ninth offering, it
is traditional that our fair Queen
shall choose between a pre-selected
newblood and a specially ordained
Hårgan...
Sten turns to an Elder standing beside a large BALL CAGE (as
generally used in bingo) at the end of the platform. The
cage holds about a hundred WOODEN BALLS (the size of ping-
pong balls) with a different RUNIC NAME carved into each.
The Man rotates the ball cage, which then dispenses a single
BALL. The man holds up the ball and reads the name aloud:
BALL MAN
Dag.
STEN
Honorable Dag! Please step forward.
DAG, a man in his late 50s, looks like he just won the
lottery. He takes a step forward, beaming with pride.
STEN (CONT’D)
And Christian Hughes.
A Hårgan man now wheels Christian, whose eyes are locked
wide, away from the base of the stage. He positions Christian
beside Dag to also be facing the stage. Christian is shocked
at the sight of Dani.
STEN (CONT’D)
(to Dani)
These are your candidates for the
ninth and final offering. We
patiently await your verdict.
Christian tries to scream, but this only results in muffled
moans. His eyes BEG Dani for mercy. Her eyes are GLASS.
The community waits as Dani makes her silent deliberation.
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Dani’s EYES settle fixedly on CHRISTIAN. A wave of intense
EMOTION suddenly animates Dani’s face. Sadness, anger, love,
heartbreak... These feelings are finally wrestled down, and
her expression becomes BLANK again. Her EYES, still trained
on Christian, have HARDENED. They narrow pointedly to suggest
that she’s made her decision. Sten understands.
STEN (CONT’D)
(to the crowd)
The honor has been bestowed on
Christian Hughes, our ninth and most
sacred offering!
Christian’s muffled screams now become hysterical. He has
turned blue in the face. Dani’s gaze remains steely and
absent.
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Scene 41 - The Burning of Christian
CU of a WHEEL rolling across the grass. Tracking alongside
this, we tilt up to reveal that it belongs to a WHEELBARROW.
Lying in the wheelbarrow is CONNIE’S CORPSE. It is soaking wet
and its flesh is grossly distended (from being left
underwater). She is wearing the same outfit (of greenery and
jewels) that was used earlier for the sacrificial tree (which
was fed to the lake).
Continuing to track alongside the wheelbarrow (which is
pushed by a young male Hårgan), we pull back to EXPAND OUR
VIEW. We reveal that the Hårgan is carting Connie’s corpse
toward the yellow-painted TRIANGULAR TEMPLE, which was
previously off-limits. It stands in the center of an open
field. Its door is now OPEN.
We settle on a static wide of this until a NEW CART is pushed
into frame. We now follow this cart, keeping it centered in
frame. This cart holds MARK’S “CORPSE.” In fact, it is just
his hollowed out SKIN - stuffed with straw and hay. Atop his
head is a jester’s hat.
Peripherally, other bodies are being carted toward the house.
We continue to track ahead, following Mark’s cart INTO the
SACRED HOUSE...
115 INT. SACRED HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 115
The interior is completely adorned in greenery. An impossibly
lush mausoleum. In the center is a PLATFORM made of hay.
Connie’s corpse is rested against one wall.
Mark’s is seated against the opposite wall.
Beyond them, to either side, are the TWO ELDER TREE-CORPSES
that were standing upright in the crowd. The male body is
surrounded by his most precious belongings (jewelry, books,
etc.). The dead female elder is also surrounded by her most
prized possessions.
Beyond them, at the far end of the temple, is...
JOSH’S BODY, which is covered in dirt and soil. His eyes and
nostrils are clogged with earth. His face is locked into a
gagged scream, his mouth utterly stuffed with paper (from the
Rubi Radr). Stacks of books rest on his lap (and atop those,
his smartphone stands on its side, facing outward). And
beside Josh...
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SIMON’S CORPSE. He is now in the same dress as the rest of
the corpses, but the eyes are still replaced by bright
flowers.
116 EXT. BOOKBINDING HOUSE - SAME TIME 116
We are PUSHING TOWARD the bookbinding house, whose doors are
open. To the side of it, Ulf and Ingemar are being embraced
passionately by several members of the community.
117 INT. BOOK-BINDING ROOM - SAME TIME 117
A room that is typically used for book-binding. Its walls are
lined with collector’s editions of books.
A DEAD BEAR (seen earlier, alive and caged) lies on the island
table. A deep INCISION has been drawn from the animal’s neck to
its groin. Two Hårgan Labourers pull out the bear’s INNARDS.
After scooping out the majority of its guts, they pile the
waste into a bucket.
Then, with the assistance of two well-built Hårgan men, the
Labourers endeavor to lift CHRISTIAN’s paralyzed body.
Christian is fitted into the bear’s hollowed out carcass.
They start by inserting his limp legs into the bear’s legs.
118 INT. SACRED HOUSE - MINUTES LATER 118
Humming and music has started very quietly outside.
Christian has been secured into the giant bear carcass. The
incision (from its groin to its neck) has been SEWN UP. The
bear’s JAW has been removed, creating a gaping HOLE (down to
its upper chest) through which Christian’s FACE is visible.
Five Hårgan labourers plant the bear carcass in the CENTER of
the hay platform. Its back rests against a hay pile. Christian
is still unable to move or speak. His muffled screams persist.
A man dressed as “Vídorr” (god of vengeance) stands before
Christian. He holds the Rubi Radr in his hands.
VÍDORR
(in Swedish)
Mighty and dreadful beast. With
you, we purge our most unholy
Affekts. We banish you now to the
deepest recesses, where you may
reflect on your wickedness.
Ingemar and Ulf are now seated on haystacks. They are also
surrounded by their most prized belongings. Mats stands
before Ingemar, who smiles widely. He pours a thick, sappy
LIQUID into Ingemar’s mouth.
MATS
(in Swedish)
Drink from the yew tree. Feel no
fear.
Mats moves to Ulf. He pours the liquid into his mouth as
well.
MATS (CONT’D)
(in Swedish)
Drink from the yew tree. Feel no
pain.
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Mats leaves the house. Now, THREE HÅRGAN MEN enter with
FLAMING TORCHES. The music begins to rise outside, including
the wordless, microtonal SINGING we’ve come to recognize.
The men approach Christian, whose “screaming” has become
horribly frenzied.
The men move to different sides of the hay platform. They
form a TRIANGLE. Simultaneously, they touch their torches to
the hay - igniting a FIRE.
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Scene 42 - Ascension Through Fire
The torch-men exit the house. Inside, the fire has begun to
spread along the platform.
The music rises as the fire picks up. The SINGING, which
wavers in trembling anticipation, has not yet found harmony.
Dani watches this with dissociated eyes. She stands tensely
in the field, eyes locked on the fire. Behind her, all of
Hårga is enraptured.
120 INT. SACRED HOUSE - SAME TIME 120
The fire has grown considerably. Inside the bear, Christian
is now being steam-boiled in the animal’s fluids.
The bear’s FUR begins to catch fire. Before long, the whole
animal is swallowed in the blaze. Christian’s wretched face
becomes invisible behind the flames.
Ulf and Ingemar (still smiling) watch this with detached
fascination.
The fire has now spread to other piles of hay. It has begun
to crawl up the walls of the house.
Ulf is suddenly consumed by flames. He SCREAMS!
121 EXT. FIELD - SAME TIME 121
Ulf’s screams are heard from the Sacred House. Suddenly, every
member of the Hårgan community (who is not singing) begins to
SCREAM as well. Feeling Ulf’s pain, they emit a horrible chorus
of wails. When Ulf’s screams die down, so do theirs.
Meanwhile, Ruben has been given paper to PAINT on. Two elders
encourage him.
DANI, watching the burning house with fraught eyes, is
suddenly met with a wave of conflicting emotions. Her
expression curdles into one of sheer HORROR and DISGUST. Then
it becomes one of deep SORROW and SHAME. Her eyes well with
tears. The singing has now HARMONIZED and has risen to an
insane, operatic pitch.
We cut to an immense WIDE. Dani’s back is in the f.g. and the
burning house is in the b.g. Overcome, Dani buries her face in
her hands. Breaking into gentle sobs, she begins to walk
aimlessly to the side. We TRACK alongside her, keeping her
centered. She is circling the house, pulling at her hair and
face in increasing anguish. She is WEEPING now, and the house
(ever-present in the b.g.) has become ENGULFED in the raging
flames.
Dani begins MOANING and SCREAMING. Her howls almost harmonize
with the singing in the b.g. The fire ROARS and CRACKLES in
the distance. It’s apocalyptic.
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Soon it’s uncertain whether Dani is crying or LAUGHING. Her
legs become weak and she collapses to her knees. Four Hårgans
(one of them being Pelle) run into the scene, carrying a
LARGE CHAIR - Dani’s throne.
The Hårgans lift Dani by the arms and SEAT her in the throne.
They then HOIST the chair into the air.
On the upward LIFT, we cut to a tight CLOSE-UP of Dani’s
face. She is being carried forward. Her expression, which
begins as one of great distress, slowly starts to TURN. Her
agony subsides into sudden CONFUSION. What’s happening?
Where am I? I’m on this chair, being carried! Her expression
goes from FEAR to EXCITEMENT to CONFUSION again. She
suddenly lets out an abrupt LAUGH (which we can’t hear over
the music and the now-deafening FIRE). Dani is now being
taken over by an invading sense of pride and contentment.
This soon evolves into a manic exhilaration. Dani BEAMS. She
has been embraced by a new family. She is Queen. She is not
alone.
A SMILE finally breaks onto Dani’s face. (For some, this smile
might recall the photo of Dani in her parent’s bedroom at the
beginning of the film.) She has surrendered to a joy known
only by the insane. She has lost herself completely, and she
is finally free. It is horrible and it is beautiful.
FADE TO BLACK.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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dani | Dani's character arc begins with her as a caring and anxious individual, deeply concerned about her family and struggling with emotional vulnerability. As she confronts the unsettling customs of the Hårga community, her initial skepticism and fear evolve into curiosity and engagement. Throughout the screenplay, she faces intense emotional turmoil, particularly in response to the community's rituals, which challenge her perception of reality. Dani's journey is marked by moments of introspection and emotional breakdown, leading to a significant transformation as she embraces her role as the May Queen. By the end, she transitions from a state of confusion and fear to one of empowerment and liberation, ultimately making a steely decision that impacts the fate of others, showcasing her growth and resilience. | Dani's character arc is compelling and showcases a significant emotional journey. However, the transition from her initial vulnerability to empowerment as the May Queen could benefit from more gradual development. While her emotional breakdowns are impactful, they may come across as abrupt without sufficient buildup of her internal conflicts and motivations. Additionally, her relationship dynamics, particularly with Christian, could be explored further to enhance the emotional stakes and provide a clearer contrast to her eventual empowerment. | To improve Dani's character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that highlight her internal struggles and the evolution of her relationship with Christian. This could involve deeper conversations that reveal her fears and insecurities, allowing the audience to connect with her on a more personal level. Additionally, introducing moments of agency where Dani actively confronts her fears before the climax could create a more satisfying transition to her role as the May Queen. Finally, exploring her interactions with other characters in the Hårga community could provide a richer context for her transformation, showcasing how she navigates and ultimately reconciles her conflicting emotions. |
christian | Christian's character arc begins with him as a pragmatic and somewhat dismissive partner to Dani, who struggles to connect with her emotional needs. As the narrative unfolds, he becomes increasingly conflicted, torn between his academic ambitions and his relationship with Dani. His initial skepticism towards the Hårga community's traditions gradually shifts to curiosity, revealing his internal conflict. However, his opportunistic nature leads him to prioritize his research over Dani's emotional struggles, causing tension in their relationship. As he becomes more entangled in the Hårga rituals, Christian's moral compass is challenged, leading to feelings of guilt and confusion. The climax of his arc occurs during the sacrificial ritual, where he faces the consequences of his actions, ultimately becoming a victim of the cult's dark practices. This transformation from a dismissive partner to a paralyzed victim symbolizes his internal turmoil and the horror of his choices. | Christian's character arc is compelling but could benefit from deeper exploration of his motivations and emotional struggles. While his internal conflict is evident, the screenplay sometimes relies on surface-level traits, making it difficult for the audience to fully empathize with his journey. His transition from a rational partner to a victim of the cult's practices feels abrupt, and the emotional stakes could be heightened to create a more impactful transformation. Additionally, the portrayal of his relationship with Dani could be more nuanced, allowing for moments of vulnerability that would make his eventual downfall more tragic. | To improve Christian's character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into his backstory and the reasons behind his emotional distance. This could include flashbacks or conversations that reveal his past experiences and fears, making his internal conflict more relatable. Additionally, enhance the dynamic between Christian and Dani by showcasing moments of genuine connection and vulnerability, which would heighten the emotional stakes of their relationship. Gradually build his moral ambiguity throughout the screenplay, allowing the audience to witness his descent into opportunism and the resulting consequences. Finally, ensure that his transformation during the sacrificial ritual is foreshadowed and emotionally resonant, emphasizing the tragic nature of his character arc. |
mark | Mark's character arc begins with him as a laid-back individual who serves as a stabilizing force within the group. As the narrative unfolds, he faces internal and external conflicts that force him to confront his insecurities and fears. This leads to a more confrontational and aggressive side emerging, particularly in his interactions with Christian, where he grapples with feelings of anger and vulnerability. Ultimately, the revelation of Mark being a larger man in disguise serves as a climax to his arc, symbolizing the loss of his identity and the transformation into a more sinister version of himself. This shift highlights the themes of fear, identity, and the duality of human nature, culminating in a tragic and horrifying conclusion. | While Mark's character arc is intriguing and offers a compelling exploration of identity and emotional struggle, it may benefit from deeper development in certain areas. The transition from a laid-back persona to a confrontational figure feels abrupt, and the motivations behind this shift could be more clearly articulated. Additionally, the final reveal of Mark as a larger man in disguise, while shocking, may leave audiences wanting more context regarding his transformation and the implications it has on his relationships with other characters. The arc could also explore the psychological aspects of Mark's character more thoroughly, providing insight into how his laid-back nature masks deeper fears and insecurities. | To improve Mark's character arc, consider incorporating more gradual changes in his demeanor throughout the screenplay. This could involve moments of vulnerability that foreshadow his eventual confrontation with Christian, allowing the audience to better understand his emotional struggles. Additionally, providing backstory or flashbacks that reveal the origins of his insecurities could add depth to his character. The final reveal could be enhanced by exploring the psychological implications of his transformation, perhaps through interactions with other characters that highlight their reactions to the change. This would not only enrich Mark's character but also deepen the thematic resonance of identity and fear within the narrative. |
josh | Josh's character arc begins with a strong sense of curiosity and ambition as he seeks to explore and document the Hårga culture. Initially, he is enthusiastic and eager, driven by a desire to understand and engage with the unfamiliar. However, as the story unfolds, he faces ethical dilemmas and conflicts with Christian, which challenge his beliefs and commitment to his research. This tension leads to moments of frustration and confrontation, pushing him to confront his values and the consequences of his ambition. Ultimately, Josh's arc culminates in a moment of vulnerability that forces him to reevaluate his motivations and the impact of his actions, leading to a deeper understanding of himself and the culture he sought to study. | While Josh's character arc is compelling, it could benefit from more nuanced development. His initial curiosity and enthusiasm are well-established, but the transition to frustration and confrontation feels somewhat abrupt. Additionally, his vulnerability in the face of horror could be explored further to create a more profound emotional impact. The character's motivations and internal conflicts could be more clearly defined to enhance the audience's connection to his journey. | To improve Josh's character arc, consider incorporating more gradual shifts in his emotional state. Introduce smaller moments of doubt or ethical conflict earlier in the screenplay to foreshadow his eventual frustration with Christian. Additionally, provide opportunities for Josh to reflect on his motivations and the implications of his research, perhaps through conversations with other characters or internal monologues. This would deepen his character and create a more cohesive arc that resonates with the audience. Finally, ensure that his moments of vulnerability are given adequate weight, allowing the audience to fully grasp the transformation he undergoes by the end of the feature. |
pelle | Pelle begins as a mysterious figure, serving as a guide to the Hårga community's traditions and rituals. Initially, he is seen as a calming presence, providing stability amidst escalating tensions. As the story progresses, Pelle's character deepens; he reveals his personal connection to the community and its rituals, particularly through his interactions with Dani. His sense of responsibility grows, especially when he takes it upon himself to search for the missing characters, showcasing his loyalty and leadership. By the end of the feature, Pelle emerges as a more fully realized character, having navigated the complexities of his heritage and the weight of his community's traditions, ultimately finding a balance between his personal beliefs and the expectations of his culture. | While Pelle's character is rich and layered, his arc could benefit from more explicit internal conflict. As he navigates his role within the Hårga community and his relationships with the outsiders, there are opportunities to explore his doubts or fears about the traditions he upholds. This could add depth to his character and make his eventual growth more impactful. Additionally, Pelle's motivations could be clearer; while he is portrayed as loyal and responsible, understanding what drives him personally—beyond duty to his community—would enhance his relatability. | To improve Pelle's character arc, consider introducing moments of vulnerability where he questions the traditions he holds dear or struggles with the implications of those traditions on his relationships with outsiders. This could be achieved through flashbacks or conversations with other characters that challenge his beliefs. Additionally, incorporating a subplot that highlights Pelle's personal stakes in the community's rituals—perhaps a family connection to the Ättestupan or a past trauma related to the traditions—could provide a more compelling narrative thread. Finally, allowing Pelle to make a choice that reflects his growth, such as standing up against a tradition he no longer believes in, could serve as a powerful climax for his character development. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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High Emotional Impact Scenes Indicate Strong Dialogue | Scenes with high 'Emotional Impact' scores (8 or above) tend to have very strong 'Dialogue' scores (8 or above), suggesting that impactful dialogue is driving the emotional resonance of these scenes. This is particularly noticeable in scenes 2, 4, 9, 18, 24, 34, 38, 39, and 40. |
Character Changes Are Driven By Conflict and Emotional Intensity | Scenes with significant 'Character Changes' often feature high scores in 'Conflict' and 'Emotional Impact'. This suggests that the characters are experiencing significant emotional turmoil and are being pushed to adapt or change in response to the conflict. This trend is prominent in scenes 2, 4, 9, 18, 24, 34, 38, and 40. |
Tense and Disturbing Tone Often Indicates Strong Emotional Impact | Scenes with a 'Tense' or 'Disturbing' tone tend to have high 'Emotional Impact' scores. This highlights a strong correlation between heightened tension and disturbing elements in evoking emotional responses from the audience. This pattern is prevalent in scenes 8, 9, 12, 17, 18, 21, 24, 29, 31, 33, 34, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40, and 41. |
Mysterious and Surreal Elements Enhance Character Development | Scenes with 'Mysterious' or 'Surreal' tones often have high 'Character Changes' scores. This suggests that these elements contribute to the characters' internal struggles, forcing them to confront their own fears, desires, or hidden truths. This is evident in scenes 11, 12, 13, 14, 16, 17, 21, 23, 26, 27, 28, 29, 31, 32, 33, 34, 35, 36, 37, 38, 39, 41. |
Intense Scenes Drive the Story Forward | Scenes with high 'Intense' scores frequently have high scores in 'Move Story Forward'. This reinforces the notion that intense moments, whether thrilling, disturbing, or emotional, are essential for propelling the narrative forward. This is evident in scenes 2, 9, 10, 15, 24, 25, 26, 27, 29, 33, 37, 38, 39, 40, and 41. |
Strong Concept and Plot Drive High Overall Grades | Scenes with high 'Concept' and 'Plot' scores generally receive high 'Overall Grade' scores. This indicates a strong foundation in the screenplay's conceptual framework and plot structure, which contribute to the overall quality of the scenes. This is evident in scenes 1, 2, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 15, 19, 22, 24, 34, 37, 38, 39, 40, and 41. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay exhibits strong potential, showcasing a talent for creating engaging scenes with rich character dynamics and atmospheric settings. The writer demonstrates an ability to explore complex themes, emotional depth, and unique cultural elements. However, there are areas for improvement in terms of dialogue, pacing, and scene structure.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Read 'Save the Cat' by Blake Snyder | This book will provide invaluable insights into crafting compelling characters, structuring engaging plots, and understanding the classic beats of a screenplay, which can enhance the writer's overall storytelling skills. |
Screenplay | Read 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' screenplay by Charlie Kaufman | This screenplay is a masterclass in blending humor and emotion, exploring complex characters and themes with an insightful and unique approach. It will provide valuable lessons in crafting nuanced dialogue, exploring character depth, and creating a compelling narrative. |
Book | Read 'The Screenwriter's Bible' by David Trottier | This book offers comprehensive guidance on screenwriting structure, formatting, and storytelling techniques, providing practical tips and guidelines for enhancing the writer's craft in terms of scene structure and pacing, as well as improving dialogue and character development. |
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Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Dark Secret | Dani receives disturbing emails from her sister, hinting at a dark family history and personal struggles. | |
The Broken Relationship | Dani and Christian's relationship is strained, with Dani feeling unsupported and Christian being tempted by others. | This trope explores the complexities of romantic relationships, often leading to conflict. A notable example is in 'Marriage Story,' where a couple navigates their emotional struggles. |
The Call to Adventure | Dani is invited to Sweden for a midsummer festival, which serves as the catalyst for the story. | This trope involves a character being drawn into a new world or adventure, often leading to personal growth. An example is in 'The Hobbit,' where Bilbo is invited to join an adventure. |
The Grieving Protagonist | Dani is deeply affected by the loss of her sister and parents, influencing her emotional state throughout the story. | This trope focuses on a character dealing with loss, often leading to character development. An example is in 'A Ghost Story,' where the protagonist grapples with grief and its implications. |
The Cult | The Hårga community practices pagan rituals that become increasingly disturbing as the story progresses. | This trope involves a group with extreme beliefs that often leads to conflict with outsiders. An example is in 'The Wicker Man,' where a police officer investigates a mysterious island cult. |
The Hallucinogenic Experience | Dani and others consume magic mushrooms, leading to surreal and disturbing visions. | This trope explores altered states of consciousness, often revealing deeper truths about characters. An example is in 'Enter the Void,' where the protagonist experiences life and death through hallucinogenic experiences. |
The Final Sacrifice | Dani ultimately chooses Christian as a sacrifice in a ritual, highlighting her transformation. | This trope involves a character making a significant sacrifice, often for the greater good or personal growth. An example is in 'The Hunger Games,' where Katniss volunteers to take her sister's place. |
The Unreliable Narrator | Dani's perception of reality becomes distorted due to her grief and the influence of hallucinogens. | This trope involves a narrator whose credibility is compromised, leading to ambiguity in the story. An example is in 'Fight Club,' where the protagonist's perspective is skewed. |
The Journey to Self-Discovery | Dani's experiences in Sweden lead her to confront her grief and ultimately embrace her identity. | This trope focuses on a character's journey toward understanding themselves better. An example is in 'Eat Pray Love,' where the protagonist travels to find herself. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Grief and Loss | Dani's emotional turmoil over her sister's death and her struggle to cope with the loss is a central focus throughout the screenplay. | The theme of grief and loss is explored through Dani's character as she navigates her sister's tragic death and her own feelings of abandonment and isolation. This theme is prevalent in her interactions with Christian and her emotional breakdowns, highlighting the profound impact of loss on mental health and relationships. | ||||||||||||
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Isolation and Connection | Dani feels increasingly isolated in her relationship with Christian, who is more focused on his thesis and social life than on her emotional needs. | The theme of isolation and connection is illustrated through Dani's struggle to maintain her relationship with Christian while feeling emotionally abandoned. This theme is emphasized by her interactions with the Hårga community, which offers a sense of belonging that contrasts with her alienation from Christian. | ||||||||||||
Cultural Rituals and Belonging | The Hårga community's rituals and traditions play a significant role in the story, particularly during the Midsummer festival. | This theme examines the importance of cultural rituals in establishing a sense of belonging and identity. Dani's eventual acceptance into the Hårga community reflects her desire for connection and understanding, contrasting with her previous feelings of isolation in her relationship with Christian. | ||||||||||||
Manipulation and Control | Christian's manipulative behavior towards Dani and his interactions with the Hårga community reveal themes of control and exploitation. | The theme of manipulation and control is evident in Christian's actions, particularly when he invites Dani to Sweden under false pretenses and later engages in a relationship with Maja. This theme highlights the dynamics of power in relationships and the consequences of emotional manipulation. | ||||||||||||
Mental Health and Breakdown | Dani's mental health struggles are depicted through her anxiety, panic attacks, and eventual breakdown during the rituals. | The theme of mental health and breakdown is explored through Dani's experiences with anxiety and her emotional unraveling in the face of trauma. This theme underscores the impact of unresolved grief and the importance of mental health awareness in navigating personal crises. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a potent blend of psychological realism and unsettling horror, creating a distinct atmosphere of dread and mystery. The dialogue is often intimate, revealing complex emotional dynamics and inner turmoil. The narrative is punctuated by vivid sensory details, immersing the audience in the surreal and haunting world of the Hårga community. The direction, although not explicitly detailed, suggests a heightened sense of visual storytelling, using impactful imagery to amplify the unsettling nature of the events. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by amplifying the emotional depth and psychological complexity of the characters, while simultaneously creating an atmosphere of unease and suspense. The intimate dialogue allows for a profound exploration of human relationships and internal conflict, while the vivid descriptions of the Hårga community and its rituals build a palpable sense of otherworldliness and impending danger. This unique blend of realism and horror elevates the themes of cultural clash, identity, and the dark side of human nature, leaving the audience on edge and grappling with the complexities of the narrative. |
Best Representation Scene | 9 - Eyes of the Beast |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it masterfully blends psychological horror with vivid imagery and unsettling descriptions. The scene showcases the writer's ability to create intense emotional moments, employing sensory details to amplify the protagonist's fear and disorientation. The use of the outhouse as a confined space, the flickering candlelight, and the grotesque visual transformation of Dani's reflection effectively evoke a sense of claustrophobia and unease. This scene encapsulates the unique voice of the screenplay, highlighting its ability to unsettle and provoke the audience with a blend of psychological realism and disturbing imagery. |
- Overall originality score: 8
- Overall originality explanation: The screenplay demonstrates a high level of originality by blending familiar themes like family dynamics, grief, and relationships with unique cultural elements, particularly the Hårga community's rituals and beliefs. The screenplay effectively creates an unsettling atmosphere through unsettling visuals, disturbing events, and unsettling rituals, which contribute to the screenplay's unique feel. The screenplay's exploration of the human cost of cultural clashes, as well as the potential for moral compromise when confronting extreme beliefs, is compelling and adds to its originality.
- Most unique situations: The most unique situations in the screenplay are: the animal sacrifice ritual, the Ättestupan ritual, the May Queen competition, the revelation of Ulf wearing Mark's skin, Christian's sexual encounter with Maja during a ritual, the revelation of the Rubi Radr, and the final sacrifice of Christian. These situations are particularly unique because they combine elements of ritualistic violence, psychological horror, and cultural exploration to create a truly unique and unsettling experience for the viewer.
- Overall unpredictability score: 8.5
- Overall unpredictability explanation: The screenplay keeps the audience guessing with unexpected twists and turns. It skillfully avoids predictable plot lines and uses the unusual cultural context of the Hårga community to create an unpredictable narrative. The screenplay avoids typical horror tropes, Instead, it uses unsettling imagery, shocking events, and a slow build-up of suspense to create a truly unpredictable experience. This unpredictability is further enhanced by the gradual unveiling of the Hårga's beliefs and rituals, leaving the audience unsure of what to expect next and creating a sense of unease and anticipation throughout the story.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | Throughout the script, Dani's internal goals evolve from seeking validation and reassurance from her partner and grappling with family turmoil to confronting deeper feelings of grief, identity, and belonging in the face of tragic events and unsettling traditions. |
External Goals | Dani's external goals transition from trying to address family dynamics and establish a solid relationship with Christian to engaging with and participating in the customs of the Hårgan community, culminating in her acceptance of deeply disturbing practices that challenge her moral compass. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay revolves around the tension between individuality and community belonging, as Dani struggles with her own beliefs about sacrifice, identity, and her role within both her family and the Hårga society. This conflict is amplified by her need for validation and connection against the backdrop of deeply entrenched communal traditions that often require unsettling personal sacrifices. |
Character Development Contribution: Dani's goals and the philosophical conflicts she faces drive her character development from a state of insecurity and fear to one of acceptance and realization. By confronting her emotions and integrating herself into a community with radically different beliefs, she evolves into a character who ultimately embraces her identity, albeit through a lens of horror that complicates her sense of self.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts establish a clear narrative arc where Dani's initial quest for closeness and validation shapes her interactions and decisions throughout the story, leading to increasingly intense and provocative situations. This transformation also aligns the external action with her internal journey, creating a cohesive and compelling narrative progression.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The interplay of Dani's goals and the philosophical conflicts enriches the screenplay's thematic depth, exploring themes of grief, belonging, sacrifice, and the nature of identity. Through her experiences, the screenplay challenges the audience to consider the cost of community and the sacrifices individuals make in pursuit of love and acceptance, ultimately leaving lingering questions about morality and personal agency.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
- Physical environment: The screenplay presents a stark contrast between the serene natural beauty of the Swedish landscape, particularly Hälsingland, and the familiar, suburban settings of Minnesota and Brooklyn. The Swedish environment is characterized by lush meadows, dense forests, a triangular temple, a giant yellow house, runic symbols, and a farmstead with a central house that has a hole in the floor. The Minnesota and Brooklyn environments are modern and familiar, featuring houses, apartments, pizza parlors, and Lyft rides.
- Culture: The Hårgan community is the central element of the screenplay's cultural world, and it is depicted as a cult-like group with unique rituals and beliefs deeply rooted in pagan traditions. They practice animal sacrifice, have a hierarchical society with specific age-based roles and a distinct form of paganism. They celebrate Saint John the Baptist, perform a ritual dance around the Maypole, and engage in various other rituals, including Ättestupan, a form of ceremonial suicide. The screenplay also explores the contrasts between Hårgan culture and American culture through the characters' experiences and interactions.
- Society: The Hårgan community is depicted as a tightly knit and isolated society with a hierarchical structure. There are clear distinctions between roles and responsibilities based on age and gender. The community's decisions are made by the elders, who hold a great deal of authority. The community is also highly secretive, with members engaging in activities that are kept hidden from outsiders.
- Technology: Technology plays a minimal role in the Hårgan community, reflecting their adherence to ancient traditions. The characters primarily use basic tools, and their lives are largely unaffected by modern technology. However, technology serves as a contrast to the Hårgan community's way of life, with the characters using phones, laptops, and modern transportation. These elements highlight the stark differences between modern society and the Hårgan community.
- Characters influence: The unique world elements shape the characters' experiences and actions in several ways. Dani, the protagonist, is initially drawn to the Hårgan community's beauty and traditions, but she is also disturbed by their rituals and beliefs. She struggles to reconcile her own values with those of the Hårgan community, leading to a clash of cultures and a sense of unease. The characters are also influenced by the Hårgan community's rituals and practices, with some embracing them and others resisting them. The Hårgan community's rituals and beliefs affect the characters' perceptions of reality, leading to hallucinations, paranoia, and emotional breakdowns.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay by creating a sense of mystery, suspense, and intrigue. The Hårgan community's secretive nature and their unique rituals and beliefs create an atmosphere of unease and anticipation. The screenplay's narrative unfolds as the characters are drawn into the Hårgan community's world and face the consequences of their involvement. The juxtaposition of the modern world and the Hårgan community's ancient traditions creates a powerful contrast that drives the narrative.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of culture clash, tradition, and the nature of reality. The Hårgan community's rituals and beliefs are presented as a stark contrast to the values of modern society. The screenplay raises questions about the nature of truth, identity, and the boundaries of human experience. The Hårgan community's rituals and practices also raise questions about the role of sacrifice, the nature of belonging, and the consequences of pushing the boundaries of human experience.
central conflict
Dani's struggle with grief over her sister's death and her tumultuous relationship with Christian, set against the backdrop of a disturbing pagan festival.
primary motivations
- Dani's desire to connect with her sister and process her grief.
- Christian's ambition to research the Hårgas for his thesis.
- The Hårga community's need to uphold their traditions and rituals.
catalysts
- Dani receiving a disturbing email from her sister.
- Christian's decision to invite Dani to Sweden, despite his intentions.
- The group's arrival at the Hårga community and their immersion in the rituals.
barriers
- Dani's emotional instability and grief preventing her from fully engaging with Christian.
- Christian's conflicting feelings about his relationship with Dani and his attraction to Maja.
- The Hårga community's insular nature and their rituals that challenge the group's understanding.
themes
- Grief and loss.
- Cultural clash and the search for belonging.
- Manipulation and control within relationships.
stakes
The emotional and psychological well-being of Dani, the integrity of her relationship with Christian, and the potential for life or death decisions within the Hårga rituals.
uniqueness factor
The integration of psychological horror with cultural exploration, showcasing a unique blend of personal trauma and communal rituals.
audience hook
The suspense surrounding Dani's emotional journey and the unsettling nature of the Hårga rituals, keeping viewers on edge.
paradoxical engine or bisociation
The juxtaposition of Dani's personal grief against the collective celebration of life and death within the Hårga community, creating a tension between individual suffering and communal rituals.
paradoxical engine or bisociation 2
The contrast between the idyllic Swedish landscape and the horrific events that unfold, highlighting the duality of beauty and terror in human experience.
Engine: Gemini
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
Midsommar is a masterfully crafted horror screenplay that utilizes stunning visuals, unsettling atmosphere, and compelling character arcs to deliver a truly unique and unforgettable experience. The story masterfully blends psychological horror with folk horror, creating a chillingly believable world where traditions collide with modern anxieties. While the screenplay does contain some minor pacing issues, its strengths far outweigh any weaknesses. It is a highly recommendable script for its originality, disturbing themes, and gripping narrative.
- The screenplay boasts a strong, visually arresting narrative that pulls the audience into a disturbing yet captivating world. The slow-burn approach, building tension and unease, culminates in a horrifying climax that leaves a lasting impression. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Scene 9 Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 Scene 17 Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay skillfully blends psychological and folk horror elements, creating a chilling atmosphere of dread and suspense that keeps the audience on edge throughout. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Scene 9 Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 Scene 17 Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay features strong character development, delving into the complexities of Dani's psychological journey as she confronts grief, trauma, and the unsettling realities of the cult's practices. high ( Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Scene 9 Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 Scene 17 Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay effectively utilizes symbolism and imagery to create a layered and disturbing narrative that resonates on both a conscious and subconscious level. high ( Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Scene 9 Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 Scene 17 Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay's pacing is expertly crafted to heighten the sense of unease and create a gradual escalation of horror. The slow-burn approach builds tension effectively, culminating in a shocking and unforgettable finale. medium ( Scene 2 Scene 3 Scene 4 Scene 5 Scene 6 Scene 7 Scene 8 Scene 9 Scene 10 Scene 11 Scene 12 Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 Scene 17 Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 20 Scene 21 Scene 22 Scene 23 Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay could benefit from further development of the supporting characters. While some secondary characters are intriguing, their motivations and backstories could be explored more fully to add depth and complexity to the narrative. medium ( Scene 42 )
- The screenplay's pacing could be adjusted slightly to ensure a more consistent and engaging flow. Some scenes might benefit from trimming or reordering to maintain the audience's interest. low ( Scene 42 )
- While the screenplay does a good job of building tension and creating a disturbing atmosphere, further exploration of the Hårga’s beliefs and rituals might enhance the overall impact of the story. Expanding on the origins and significance of their traditions would deepen the audience’s understanding of the cult’s practices and add layers of complexity to the narrative. medium ( Scene 42 )
- The screenplay skillfully uses visuals and symbolism to create a disturbing and unsettling atmosphere. The use of light and darkness, color and texture, and the juxtaposition of idyllic and unsettling imagery contribute to the screenplay's unique and memorable style. high ( Scene 42 )
- The screenplay effectively uses the motif of the “May Queen” to explore themes of female power, submission, and the subversion of traditional roles within the Hårga community. This adds layers of complexity and intrigue to the narrative, prompting the audience to question the nature of power and control within the cult. high ( Scene 42 )
- Cultural Sensitivity The screenplay, while exploring the dark side of a pagan cult, might benefit from further exploration of the cultural and historical context of the Hårga’s practices. Ensuring a nuanced and accurate portrayal of the culture, while acknowledging the potential sensitivities surrounding certain rituals, would enhance the screenplay's credibility and depth. medium
- Lack of Detailed Character Motivation While the screenplay focuses on Dani's journey, some of the supporting characters could benefit from further development to clarify their motivations. For example, while we see Christian's interest in the Hårga, it's unclear what specifically draws him to them, which could be further explored in the dialogue or through subtle actions. low
Engine: GPT4
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Midsommar' is a masterful blend of horror and psychological drama, exploring themes of grief, isolation, and cultural dislocation. The character arcs are intricately woven into the narrative, with Dani's transformation from a vulnerable woman to a powerful figure within a foreign community serving as a compelling focal point. The screenplay's unique setting and ritualistic elements create a haunting atmosphere that lingers long after the story concludes.
- The screenplay effectively establishes a haunting atmosphere from the outset, using vivid imagery and sound to immerse the audience in the world of the Hårgas. high ( Scene 1 (1-4) Scene 2 (5-6) )
- Character development is a significant strength, particularly in Dani's arc, which showcases her emotional journey and transformation throughout the narrative. high ( Scene 3 (7-12) Scene 4 (15-16) )
- The screenplay's pacing is well-structured, balancing moments of tension with quieter, introspective scenes that allow for character reflection. medium ( Scene 5 (17-18) Scene 6 (25-26) )
- The use of symbolism and ritualistic elements throughout the screenplay adds depth and layers of meaning, enhancing the overall narrative. high ( Scene 6 (29-30) Scene 7 (31-32) )
- The screenplay's ability to evoke strong emotional responses from the audience, particularly through its exploration of grief and loss, is a notable strength. high ( Scene 8 (25A-25C) Scene 9 (26-28) )
- Some dialogue can feel overly expository, particularly in scenes where characters discuss their motivations and feelings, which could be shown more subtly through actions. medium ( Scene 4 (15-16) )
- The pacing in certain sections, particularly during the buildup to the climax, could be tightened to maintain tension and engagement. medium ( Scene 5 (17-18) )
- Some characters, particularly the male friends, could benefit from deeper development to enhance their motivations and relationships with Dani. medium ( Scene 6 (25-26) )
- The resolution of certain plot threads, particularly regarding the fate of the male characters, could be more clearly defined to avoid confusion. medium ( Scene 7 (31-32) )
- The emotional transitions of characters, especially during intense scenes, could be more gradual to enhance believability. medium ( Scene 8 (25A-25C) )
- A deeper exploration of the cultural background of the Hårgas could enhance the audience's understanding and investment in the story. high ( Scene 4 (15-16) )
- More insight into Dani's internal struggles and thoughts could provide a richer emotional experience for the audience. high ( Scene 5 (17-18) )
- The motivations behind the rituals and their significance to the Hårga community could be more explicitly articulated. medium ( Scene 6 (25-26) )
- A clearer depiction of the consequences of the characters' actions could enhance the narrative's stakes. medium ( Scene 7 (31-32) )
- The emotional aftermath of the climax could be explored further to provide closure for the audience. medium ( Scene 8 (25A-25C) )
- The opening scenes effectively set the tone and atmosphere, drawing the audience into the world of the Hårgas with striking visuals and sound. high ( Scene 1 (1-4) )
- The use of foreshadowing in early scenes hints at the darker themes to come, creating a sense of unease that permeates the narrative. high ( Scene 2 (5-6) )
- The screenplay's exploration of grief and its impact on relationships is a poignant and relatable theme that resonates throughout the story. high ( Scene 3 (7-12) )
- The character dynamics, particularly between Dani and Christian, are complex and evolve throughout the screenplay, adding depth to the narrative. high ( Scene 4 (15-16) )
- The climactic scenes are visually and emotionally impactful, leaving a lasting impression on the audience. high ( Scene 5 (17-18) )
- Character Motivation The motivations of some secondary characters, particularly the male friends, are not fully explored, leaving their actions feeling somewhat superficial. For example, Christian's friends often serve as comic relief but lack depth in their own arcs. medium
- Expository Dialogue Some scenes contain dialogue that feels overly expository, where characters explain their feelings or motivations rather than showing them through actions. This can detract from the natural flow of the narrative. medium
Memorable lines in the script:
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19 | Josh: You think I don’t know what you’re doing? It’s actually kind of outrageously unsubtle. The fact that you’re being this bald about it. I’m honestly impressed. |
10 | Dani: Nothing means anything! We’re just alone. |
1 | Dani: I love you. |
21 | Dani: NO!!! |
42 | Dani: She has surrendered to a joy known only by the insane. She has lost herself completely, and she is finally free. It is horrible and it is beautiful. |