Erin Brokovich
Executive Summary
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USP: This legal drama follows a fiery and determined lawyer, Erin Brockovich, as she uncovers a shocking environmental contamination case that threatens the health of a small town. Through her relentless investigation and unwavering advocacy, Erin faces corporate greed and bureaucratic obstacles, navigating complex legal battles and personal challenges. The script offers a unique and empowering story of justice and perseverance, showcasing the resilience and determination of a single mother fighting for the rights of her community. Its distinctive character dynamics, authentic dialogue, and compelling narrative make this script a standout in the legal drama genre.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Legal, Thriller, Mystery, Comedy, Romance, Family, Biography, Character Study, Investigative, Legal Drama
Setting: Contemporary, Southern California, Hinkley
Overview: The screenplay for Erin Brockovich demonstrates a strong foundation with compelling characters, a clear and engaging premise, and effective exploration of relevant themes. The narrative structure is well-defined, and the screenplay successfully utilizes conflict and stakes to drive the story forward. While there are opportunities to enhance pacing, deepen character development, and refine the resolution of certain plot points, the overall quality and marketability of the screenplay are high.
Themes: Environmental Justice, Women Empowerment, Corporate Greed and Accountability, Human Connection and Community, Overcoming Adversity
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflict revolves around the legal battle against PG&E for water contamination, with the stakes being justice for the affected families and the truth coming to light.
Overall Mood: Inspiring and empowering
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: Tense and emotional confrontation between Erin and Ed
Standout Features:
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$30-40 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of legal dramas, environmental activists
Marketability: Strong storyline with compelling characters, relevant social themes, and potential for critical acclaim
Unique blend of legal drama and environmental activism, based on a true story with emotional depth
Appeal to a wide adult audience, inspirational narrative, and strong performances
Profit Potential: High, due to critical acclaim potential, strong audience appeal, and relevance of the themes
Scene Level Percentiles
The screenplay exhibits strengths in emotional impact, character development, and goal clarity. Areas for improvement include plot structure, originality, and pacing. The writer's intuitive style is evident, with opportunities to enhance the balance of screenplay elements for greater impact.
Screenplay Analysis
Key Strengths
Note: The ratings are the averages of all the scenes.
- The screenplay has a strong emotional impact, with a percentile ranking of 79.75%
- The internal goal of the characters is well-developed, with a high percentile ranking of 84.18%
- The characters experience significant changes throughout the story, as indicated by the high percentile ranking of 75.98%
- The plot structure could be improved, as indicated by the lower percentile ranking of 32.23%
- The originality of the screenplay could be enhanced, with a percentile ranking of 68.35%
- The pacing of the screenplay could be more engaging, as suggested by the low percentile ranking of 17.09%
The writer's style appears to be more intuitive, with higher percentile rankings in character development and dialogue, and lower rankings in concept and plot.
Balancing Elements- To enhance the screenplay's overall balance, the writer could consider strengthening the plot structure while maintaining the strengths in character development and emotional impact.
- Balancing the originality with more conventional elements could make the screenplay more accessible to a wider audience.
- Improving the pacing could complement the strong emotional impact and character changes, creating a more engaging experience for readers.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay has strong potential, with compelling characters and emotional depth. Refinement in plot structure, originality, and pacing could elevate the screenplay to a higher level of effectiveness.
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How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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| 8.75 | 96 | Memento: 8.50 | Erin Brokovich: 8.75 | |
| 8.50 | 95 | Interstellar: 8.46 | Erin Brokovich: 8.50 | |
| Internal Goal | 8.28 | 86 | The Pianist: 8.26 | Erin Brokovich: 8.28 |
| 8.75 | 85 | The Fabelmans: 8.50 | Erin Brokovich: 8.75 | |
| Emotional Impact | 8.1 | 74 | Cruel Intentions: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
| Character Changes | 7.2 | 73 | Inside Out: 7.1 | Erin Brokovich: 7.2 |
| External Goal | 7.44 | 63 | Squid Game: 7.43 | Erin Brokovich: 7.44 |
| Originality | 8.76 | 58 | groundhog day: 8.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.76 |
| Characters | 8.3 | 56 | Inception: 8.2 | Erin Brokovich: 8.3 |
| Dialogue | 7.7 | 52 | Die Hard: 7.6 | Erin Brokovich: 7.7 |
| Conflict Level | 7.7 | 50 | American Beauty: 7.6 | Erin Brokovich: 7.7 |
| High Stakes | 7.6 | 50 | Ghostbusters: 7.5 | Erin Brokovich: 7.6 |
| Story Forward | 8.1 | 49 | Inside Out: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
| Structure | 8.13 | 48 | Witness: 8.12 | Erin Brokovich: 8.13 |
| 7.75 | 47 | Inception: 7.50 | Erin Brokovich: 7.75 | |
| Engagement | 8.95 | 45 | a few good men: 8.94 | Erin Brokovich: 8.95 |
| 8.00 | 45 | Inside Out: 7.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.00 | |
| 8.25 | 44 | House of cards pilot: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 | |
| Formatting | 8.13 | 42 | Deep Cover: 8.12 | Erin Brokovich: 8.13 |
| 8.25 | 42 | The Hudsucker Proxy: 8.00 | Erin Brokovich: 8.25 | |
| Plot | 7.8 | 37 | House of cards pilot: 7.7 | Erin Brokovich: 7.8 |
| Unpredictability | 7.34 | 34 | Charlie and The Choclate Factory: 7.33 | Erin Brokovich: 7.34 |
| 8.00 | 28 | Inside Out: 7.75 | Erin Brokovich: 8.00 | |
| 7.50 | 26 | 2001: 7.25 | Erin Brokovich: 7.50 | |
| Concept | 7.8 | 22 | American Beauty: 7.7 | Erin Brokovich: 7.8 |
| Pacing | 8.15 | 18 | The Fabelmans: 8.14 | Erin Brokovich: 8.15 |
| Overall | 8.1 | 17 | Cruel Intentions: 8.0 | Erin Brokovich: 8.1 |
| 11335 | 17 | Cruel Intentions: 9780 | Erin Brokovich: 11335 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and realistic dialogue, vivid descriptions, and a blend of humor and drama. The dialogue is direct, passionate, and emotionally charged, reflecting the characters' determination and resilience. The narrative is filled with tension, conflict, and emotional depth, highlighting the complexities of the characters' struggles and relationships.
Best representation: Scene 14 - Road Trip Conversations and Toxic Water Discovery. This scene could serve as the encapsulation of the writer's unique voice in the screenplay due to its sharp dialogue, nuanced character interactions, and thematic depth. The writer's voice is evident in every line, contributing to the scene's impact and meaning.
Memorable Lines:
- Erin: I want my fucking money (Scene 28)
- Erin: I know the difference between right and wrong! (Scene 20)
- Erin: People are dying, Ross. You got document after document here, right under your nose, that says why, and you haven't said word one about it. I wanna know how the hell you sleep at night. (Scene 21)
- Erin: I'm not everyone else, Mr. Masry. I'm someone you made promises to that you didn't deliver on. I trusted you. With my kids' well-being. Now, I'm smart, and I'm hard-working, and I'll do anything. But if you think I'm leaving here without a job, you got another thing coming. (Scene 4)
- Ed: I will present your offer to my clients. I doubt they'll accept it. (Scene 16)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a consistently strong writing style characterized by sharp dialogue, complex character dynamics, and thought-provoking themes. The dialogue is particularly noteworthy for its wit, realism, and ability to drive the narrative forward.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- David Mamet
- Greta Gerwig
- Erin Brockovich
Story Shape
Engine: Claude
Screenplay Rating:
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Erin Brockovich' is a well-crafted and engaging drama that tells the true story of a determined legal assistant who helps a community take on a powerful corporation. The protagonist, Erin Brockovich, is a complex and compelling character whose personal journey drives the narrative forward. The screenplay effectively balances the larger legal/environmental conflict with the individual struggles of the characters, creating a sense of authenticity and high stakes. While the supporting characters could be further developed in some areas, the overall pacing and dialogue are strong, and the screenplay's exploration of themes such as justice and corporate power make it a compelling and relevant story that would appeal to a wide audience.
Strengths
- The screenplay has a strong, compelling narrative that effectively balances the personal struggles of the characters with the larger legal/environmental conflict at the heart of the story. high
- The protagonist, Erin Brockovich, is a well-developed and multi-dimensional character whose determination and growth arc drive the story forward in an engaging way. high
- The screenplay effectively depicts the real-world challenges and obstacles faced by the plaintiffs, creating a sense of authenticity and high stakes. high
- The dialogue is sharp, natural, and reveals character while also advancing the plot. medium
- The overall pacing is well-balanced, with a good mix of slower, character-driven moments and more intense, plot-driven sequences. medium
Areas of Improvement
- While the protagonist's personal journey is well-developed, some of the supporting characters could be further fleshed out to add depth and complexity to the story. medium
- There are a few moments where the exposition feels a bit heavy-handed, and the screenplay could potentially benefit from more subtle ways of conveying key information. low
MissingElements
- The screenplay could potentially be strengthened by incorporating more visual storytelling elements, such as more detailed descriptions of the setting and environment, to further immerse the audience in the world of the story. low
NotablePoints
- The screenplay's ability to balance the personal and the political, with the environmental disaster serving as a backdrop to the individual struggles of the characters, is a notable strength. high
- The screenplay's exploration of themes such as justice, corporate power, and the resilience of the human spirit are compelling and relevant to a wide audience. high
Engine: GPT4
Screenplay Rating:
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay of 'Erin Brockovich' offers a compelling narrative centered around a strong female protagonist, Erin, who evolves significantly throughout the story. The character development, combined with sharp dialogue and a well-structured plot, makes this screenplay stand out. While it could benefit from further development of secondary characters and simplification of legal terms, its strengths in creating a gripping legal drama with emotional depth are notable.
Strengths
- The screenplay features strong character development, particularly with the protagonist, Erin, whose journey from a struggling single mother to a powerful advocate is compelling and well-articulated. high
- The dialogue is sharp and engaging, with realistic exchanges that enhance the authenticity of characters and their relationships, especially in scenes of conflict or negotiation. high ( Scene 40 )
- The narrative structure effectively builds tension and stakes, culminating in satisfying resolutions that align well with the thematic focus on justice and personal growth. high ( Scene 39 )
- The screenplay effectively uses settings and environments, such as the law office and Hinkley community, to enhance the storytelling and reflect the socio-economic backgrounds of the characters. medium
- The pacing is well-managed, with a good balance of intense legal drama and personal moments that allow for character reflection and development. medium
Areas of Improvement
- Some secondary characters could be more fully developed to enhance their relationships with the protagonist and provide deeper emotional layers to the narrative. medium
- The script could benefit from a few more quieter, reflective scenes that allow the audience to process the complex legal and emotional information being presented. low
- There are moments where the legal jargon might overwhelm the lay audience; simplifying or explaining these terms within dialogues could improve accessibility. medium
- The antagonist's motivations and actions could be clearer to enhance the conflict and provide a more formidable challenge to Erin. medium
- Incorporating more visual elements that illustrate the impact of the pollution could strengthen the emotional appeal and audience's understanding of the stakes. low
MissingElements
- The script could further explore the personal lives of some key secondary characters to enrich the world around Erin and provide more subplots. medium
NotablePoints
- The script does an excellent job at portraying a strong, complex female lead whose flaws and strengths are well-balanced and compelling. high
- The use of actual legal documents and procedures adds a layer of authenticity that sets this screenplay apart from other legal dramas. medium
Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 8.25, The screenplay portrays strong character development, effectively delving into the transformation and growth of its central figures. Erin's journey from a struggling single mother to a passionate advocate and Ed's change from a cynical lawyer to a compassionate ally stand out as particularly compelling. However, certain aspects of character consistency and the development of supporting cast members could be further refined to enhance the narrative's emotional impact and character engagement. See More
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay for Erin Brockovich presents a compelling and clear premise, with the potential to deeply engage the audience. The David vs. Goliath narrative, coupled with Erin's unique character arc from struggling single mother to determined advocate, creates a strong foundation. However, the initial hook could be further refined to immediately capture the audience's attention and highlight the environmental justice theme. See More
Structure: 8.0, The screenplay exhibits a solid narrative structure with a compelling plot that effectively engages the audience. Erin Brockovich's character arc is particularly noteworthy, as she transforms from a struggling single mother to a fierce advocate for justice. However, some areas could be refined to enhance pacing and address certain plot points. See More
Theme: 8.0, The screenplay effectively conveys a central message of justice and perseverance in the face of adversity. The exploration of themes like environmental injustice, corporate malfeasance, and the power of ordinary people to make a difference is handled with clarity and impact. However, some of the finer nuances and complexities of these themes could be further explored to enhance the screenplay's overall thematic depth and resonance with the audience. See More
Visual Impact: 7.5, The screenplay for Erin Brockovich depicts key moments of Erin's legal journey and her fight for justice for the community affected by groundwater contamination. The screenplay effectively uses visual imagery to portray Erin's resilience and determination, as well as the devastating impacts of corporate negligence. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.75, The screenplay's emotional impact lies in its authentic portrayal of Erin's resilience and determination. However, opportunities exist to heighten the script's emotional depth and character development, particularly for George and Ed. See More
Conflict: 8.75, The screenplay effectively harnesses conflict and stakes to drive its narrative, presenting a compelling environmental justice story centered around Erin Brockovich's relentless pursuit of truth and justice. The conflicts are well-defined, the stakes are high, and the screenplay successfully raises these stakes, contributing to a thrilling and emotionally engaging journey. However, some aspects, such as the conflict resolution, could be refined for a more fulfilling and impactful ending. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay exhibits a strong foundation in originality and creativity, particularly in its portrayal of the protagonist's journey and the exploration of environmental injustice. The unique characterization and the narrative's focus on real-world issues make it stand out from conventional legal dramas. See More
Premise: 8.75, The screenplay for Erin Brockovich presents a compelling and clear premise, with the potential to deeply engage the audience. The David vs. Goliath narrative, coupled with Erin's unique character arc from struggling single mother to determined advocate, creates a strong foundation. However, the initial hook could be further refined to immediately capture the audience's attention and highlight the environmental justice theme. See More
Structure: 8.0, The screenplay exhibits a solid narrative structure with a compelling plot that effectively engages the audience. Erin Brockovich's character arc is particularly noteworthy, as she transforms from a struggling single mother to a fierce advocate for justice. However, some areas could be refined to enhance pacing and address certain plot points. See More
Theme: 8.0, The screenplay effectively conveys a central message of justice and perseverance in the face of adversity. The exploration of themes like environmental injustice, corporate malfeasance, and the power of ordinary people to make a difference is handled with clarity and impact. However, some of the finer nuances and complexities of these themes could be further explored to enhance the screenplay's overall thematic depth and resonance with the audience. See More
Visual Impact: 7.5, The screenplay for Erin Brockovich depicts key moments of Erin's legal journey and her fight for justice for the community affected by groundwater contamination. The screenplay effectively uses visual imagery to portray Erin's resilience and determination, as well as the devastating impacts of corporate negligence. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.75, The screenplay's emotional impact lies in its authentic portrayal of Erin's resilience and determination. However, opportunities exist to heighten the script's emotional depth and character development, particularly for George and Ed. See More
Conflict: 8.75, The screenplay effectively harnesses conflict and stakes to drive its narrative, presenting a compelling environmental justice story centered around Erin Brockovich's relentless pursuit of truth and justice. The conflicts are well-defined, the stakes are high, and the screenplay successfully raises these stakes, contributing to a thrilling and emotionally engaging journey. However, some aspects, such as the conflict resolution, could be refined for a more fulfilling and impactful ending. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay exhibits a strong foundation in originality and creativity, particularly in its portrayal of the protagonist's journey and the exploration of environmental injustice. The unique characterization and the narrative's focus on real-world issues make it stand out from conventional legal dramas. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Erin Brockovich, a strikingly attractive woman, experiences a car accident after leaving a 99-cent store. The accident brings her to the attention of Ed Masry, a senior partner at Masry & Vititoe, who becomes her potential legal representative. The scene introduces the conflicts of Erin's legal case and Ed's lack of enthusiasm.
- Single mother Erin seeks justice after a car accident leaves her with significant injuries and debt. In court, she testifies about the accident, but her credibility is challenged by the defense attorney who suggests she is exaggerating her claims. Erin's emotional testimony and flashbacks highlight the physical and emotional impact of the injuries as well as her feelings of guilt and shame.
- After a disastrous courtroom outcome, Erin confronts her lawyer, Ed, blaming him for the result and revealing her dire financial situation. She picks up her baby, Beth, from her neighbor's house, only to learn that they are moving away. At home, she discovers a giant water bug, adding to her frustrations. Erin worries about Beth's coughing and attempts to steam out the illness. Desperate, she steals children's medicine from a drugstore to help her sick baby.
- Erin confronts Ed about his broken promises and demands a job. Despite her dyslexia, Ed reluctantly hires her into the file room. Anna, a skeptical file clerk, shows Erin around the office, leading to potential conflicts in the future.
- Erin, struggling financially, secures an advance from Ed. She runs errands, buys groceries with her kids, and purchases flowers for her daughter. After tucking her kids in, Erin confronts George, a noisy biker neighbor. Despite his flirting, she asserts her boundaries. The scene concludes with Erin resuming work at Masry & Vititoe.
- Ed gives Erin a real estate file to value, but leaves before she can ask for help. Erin becomes overwhelmed and frustrated, as she doesn't know how to do the task. Anna is exasperated by Erin's confusion and leaves without assisting her. Erin refuses to leave her kids with George, despite needing help, as she hesitates to trust him due to his past behavior.
- Erin and George play War with her children, Katie and Matt. Erin tells the children to go to bed and George offers to help her with them since she's never home due to her long work hours. Erin initially declines but later accepts. As Erin reads paperwork in bed, she's confused by some medical terminology and asks Jane for help, but Jane is dismissive. Erin visits the UCLA Main Library to find more information.
- Erin Brockovich visits the UCLA Medical Library to learn more about epidemiology and meets with Dr. Paulsen, who shares information about health issues in Hinkley. Erin drives to Hinkley and introduces herself to Donna Irving, a concerned mother whose family is suffering from unexplained health problems.
- Erin, a lawyer's assistant, visits Donna, a homeowner, to discuss the sale of her house to PG&E. Donna is reluctant to sell due to health issues she believes are related to chromium contamination in the water supply. PG&E has been paying for Donna's medical expenses and has provided free spring water, but Erin is skeptical of their claims that chromium is harmless.
- Concerned about a potential link between her neighborhood and cancer cases, Erin investigates. After installing window bars for safety, friendly neighbor George inadvertently sparks Erin's curiosity. Conversations with locals and a consultation with Dr. Paulsen lead her to toxicologist David Frankel. Frankel educates Erin on the dangers of hexavalent chromium, advising her to seek information about the type of chromium in Hinkley's water, setting Erin on a quest for answers.
- Erin, determined to find water records, seeks help from Ross, the desk clerk at the Lahotan Regional Water Board. She discovers a memo on Hinkley indicating hexavalent chromium presence in groundwater. Upon returning to her firm, Erin finds her desk cleared, prompting her to question her colleague Anna.
- Erin faces a series of confrontations and frustrations throughout her day. She accuses Jane of stealing her belongings, but Jane denies the allegations. Ed informs Erin that she is being fired due to frequent absences, which she disputes. Erin's financial situation worsens when she receives a stack of bills, and an encounter with George at home further irritates her.
- Erin's kitchen is a mess, and she is frustrated by a water bug. She chases it around the kitchen, damaging the table in the process. George tries to calm her down, but she continues to obsess over the bug. Eventually, the bug crawls into a crack in the wall and Erin throws her shoe at it in frustration. She collapses into a chair, overcome with emotion and begins to cry. She expresses her feelings of worthlessness and failure to George, who tries to comfort her. They end up in bed together and George tells Erin that she is special to him. Ed Masry is unable to reach Erin at work because she has been fired. The scene ends with a close-up shot of the kitchen table, showing unpaid bills and job listings, which symbolize Erin's financial and professional struggles.
- Erin confronts Ed for firing her and demands a raise and benefits. Ed apologizes and agrees to her demands. She retrieves a document mentioning the bad chromium for Ed and he asks her to find any other similar documents.
- During a road trip, Erin and her children encounter negativity from their kids. They make stops at a compressor station, mart, and water board office, where Erin discusses toxic water with a friend, Donna. Despite Donna's initial denial, Erin's explanations about hexavalent chromium exposure lead Donna to realize the potential danger.
- Donna discovers her children swimming in a contaminated pool and orders them out. Ed and Erin return to the law firm, where they learn that Ed has rehired Erin with a raise. They meet with David Baum, a PG&E representative, who offers a settlement but denies PG&E's responsibility for the Irvings' health problems.
- Ed Masry's anger boils over after a low settlement offer from PG&E, prompting Erin Brockovich's attempts at mediation. Amidst the tension, Tom and Mandy Brown approach Erin, sharing concerns about their chickens' wry neck condition and Mandy's multiple miscarriages, sparking her suspicion of a possible connection to PG&E's environmental impact.
- Ed's reckless driving and unprofessional behavior on the way to a client meeting escalate a conflict with Erin. The clients' initial skepticism gives way to hope as Ed offers his services. Despite Erin's attempts to assist Donna, Ed's awkward attempts to connect with the clients create additional tension.
- Erin investigates chromium contamination and is determined to help affected families despite resistance from her boss.
- Erin confronts Ed about the Hinkley case and convinces him to take it on if she finds more evidence. She collects contaminated water samples and other items from Hinkley to build her case while navigating criticism from George about her parenting choices.
- Erin, a determined investigator, collects water samples and faces criticism and skepticism as she unravels a water contamination case. Despite threats and doubts, she confronts a potential suspect but encounters denial. Erin's late-night document examination highlights her commitment, leaving her resolved to continue her investigation.
- Exhausted from driving, Erin calls George to keep her awake. George shares that her daughter, Beth, has spoken her first word, "ball", affecting Erin emotionally. Erin and Ed collect signed retainer agreements at a barbecue. Erin meets Frank Melendez, who provides valuable information. George briefly takes over caring for Beth but drives off angrily after an argument with Erin. Erin receives a call that Mike Ambrosino's wife attempted suicide and is in possession of morphine pills.
- Erin visits Laura, who is bedridden and struggling with pain caused by PG&E's contamination. Meanwhile, George feels out of place among bikers while pushing his daughter in a stroller. Erin explains the negligence behind the contamination to Ed, but accidentally consumes tequila, causing distress.
- Ed and Erin work together on the PG&E case, discussing the need to prove the company's knowledge of contamination for punitive damages. Erin expresses frustration with the legal system, which Ed acknowledges. The scene shifts to the Masry & Vititoe Christmas party, where Erin and George share a kiss on her desk, noticing the lack of a gift. The arrival of Ed and his wife prompts Erin to pull away, leaving George disappointed.
- Erin and George quarrel at home while Matthew overhears their fight. Donna confides in Erin about her cancer diagnosis. Pete Irving expresses his frustration towards PG&E. Masry & Vititoe's meeting with PG&E representatives intensifies the conflict between the two parties.
- Erin and Ed meet with attorneys to discuss a settlement offer for over 100 plaintiffs. Erin argues for a higher settlement, and Ed tells her about a new plaintiff who wants to meet with her. Erin meets the new plaintiff at a gas station, but she is followed by a mysterious truck. She is able to escape and meet up with Ed at a bar.
- At a motel, Ed and Erin discuss safety concerns. Erin admits that Ed is one of the few people who doesn't annoy her. George expresses his frustration with Erin's lack of appreciation, resulting in him leaving her. Erin struggles to balance her work and personal life.
- Erin confronts her colleagues about her missing paycheck, threatening to quit if the situation isn't resolved. Despite initial resistance, Ed agrees to assist her. While waiting for her paycheck, Erin receives a package containing a substantial check and keys to a new vehicle, providing unexpected compensation for her struggles.
- Ed Masry, a lawyer, is faced with a settlement offer from PG&E for $20 million in a toxic tort case. He initially leans towards accepting the offer, but Erin Brockovich, his assistant, convinces him to turn it down because it won't cover the plaintiffs' medical bills and is less than pocket change for PG&E. Ed agrees and decides to bring on additional lawyers to continue fighting the case.
- In a tense conference room meeting, Erin faces criticism from both Theresa and Ed regarding her research. Theresa questions Erin's accuracy, sparking an angry confrontation. Ed intervenes, criticizing Erin's attitude. Potter and Ed discuss potential team changes. Despite Theresa's attempts to get Bob Linwood's attention, her efforts go unnoticed. Erin demonstrates her impressive memory by rattling off facts and numbers. The scene ends with Erin alone in the conference room, feeling isolated and disrespected.
- Theresa resorts to breaking a window to get Linwood's attention. Brenda sends confidential documents to key individuals. Erin, feeling sick at home, overhears Ed meeting with PG&E lawyers, causing hurt and anger. Ed, noticing Erin through the glass, temporarily leaves the meeting to address her.
- Erin confronts Ed for excluding her from a meeting, leading to an outburst. Later, she finds her son wandering the streets and struggles to resolve their conflict. Overcome by exhaustion and stress, Erin is admitted to the hospital after collapsing.
- George learns that Erin has meningitis and is concerned about her health. He is angry with her for not telling him about her illness and suspects that it is due to toxic waste exposure. Matt and Katie are waiting outside Erin's hospital room with Beth, and George tells them that they can stay at his place until Erin goes home. Erin is in bed, hooked up to an IV, looking exhausted. She apologizes to George for her behavior, but he is not interested in her apologies. He leaves the room, and Erin is left alone with Ed. Ed tells Erin that he is not going to fire her, but he is disappointed in her. Erin is relieved, but she is also embarrassed and ashamed.
- Ed and Erin discuss the PG&E case and the possibility of binding arbitration. Erin is eager to represent the plaintiffs, but Ed warns her against it. She defies his orders and attends the meeting, where she witnesses Kurt Potter's presentation on arbitration. Erin's frustration and determination to fight for her clients drives her to challenge the process.
- In a contentious meeting at the firehouse, feelings of mistrust and uncertainty pervade the atmosphere as the plaintiffs discuss the potential settlement amount. Erin's growing frustration leads her to take matters into her own hands, distributing copies of the release form to the plaintiffs, causing them to leave the meeting unsigned. Amidst the chaos, Erin seeks help from her ex-husband George, calling him to look after their children as she deals with the fallout from her bold move.
- Erin provides George with his own motel room and expresses her appreciation for his help. George becomes concerned about the timeline of events, but Erin assures him it will only take a few days. Erin apologizes for mistreating George, admitting that he is the first kind person to show interest in her. George suggests that she could potentially improve her behavior, and Erin replies that she is quick to learn. The scene shifts to Erin collecting signed release forms from various individuals, including Donna, Mandy, Tom, Bob, Ruth Linwood, and Mary DeSoto. The scene concludes with Erin organizing the forms in her motel room late at night.
- Erin wakes up to find her family leaving for breakfast, leaving her to rest. Matthew's questions prompt Erin to explain her situation, leading to support from her family. As Erin collects signatures for her case, she encounters Charles Embry, who shares information about potential document destruction by PG&E. Erin's determination, the support of her family, and the intriguing encounter with Embry create a mix of determination, warmth, and intrigue.
- Erin and Embry meet at the Lost Cause Saloon, where Embry reveals he found documents linking PG&E to water contamination. Despite initial hesitation, he shares the papers with Erin, who presents them to Ed Potter and his team at Masry & Vititoe, providing crucial evidence in their case against PG&E.
- Erin confronts Ed, demanding an apology and acknowledgment of her worth. Ed expresses remorse and gratitude. Erin leaves, feeling confident and successful. She meets Donna, who shares news of a substantial settlement in their favor, bringing vindication and relief.
- In his new office, Ed anticipates Erin's blackmail attempt. However, Erin surprises him by not asking for anything. Overwhelmed with relief, Ed offers her a $2 million bonus.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
| Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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| Erin Brockovich | Erin Brockovich starts off as a single mother facing financial struggles, fighting for her children's well-being. Through her relentless pursuit of justice and uncovering the truth about chromium contamination, she becomes a passionate advocate for the affected community. Despite facing challenges and going against authority, she remains determined and defiant, ultimately achieving a sense of justice and empowerment. | The character arc for Erin Brockovich is well-developed, showcasing her growth from a struggling single mother to a powerful advocate for justice. However, there could be more depth added to her internal struggles and emotional journey throughout the screenplay. Additionally, her interactions with other characters could be further explored to enhance her development and relationships. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Erin's emotional journey and internal conflicts as she navigates the challenges of fighting against powerful entities. Show more vulnerability and moments of doubt to make her character more relatable and multidimensional. Additionally, explore her relationships with other characters to add complexity and depth to her interactions. |
| Ed Masry | Ed Masry starts off as a jaded and disinterested lawyer who is skeptical of Erin but eventually comes to see her worth and potential. Through his interactions with Erin and the challenges they face together, Ed undergoes a transformation, becoming more empathetic, supportive, and willing to take risks for the sake of justice. By the end of the screenplay, Ed has evolved into a more compassionate and open-minded lawyer, willing to fight for what is right despite the obstacles in his way. | The character arc for Ed Masry is well-developed and shows a clear progression from skepticism to empathy and support. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and personal growth throughout the screenplay. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on the reasons behind his initial jadedness and disinterest in his work, providing a more nuanced portrayal of his character. | To improve the character arc for Ed Masry, consider adding scenes that delve into his backstory and motivations, shedding light on why he is initially jaded and disinterested in his work. This will provide a more well-rounded portrayal of his character and add depth to his transformation throughout the screenplay. Additionally, focus on his internal struggles and personal growth, showing the audience the emotional journey he undergoes as he learns to empathize with Erin and fight for justice. |
| Erin | Erin's character arc in the screenplay follows her journey from a vulnerable and overwhelmed single mother to a fierce and empowered advocate for justice. Throughout the story, Erin faces financial struggles, personal challenges, and self-doubt, but ultimately finds her strength and resilience in fighting for what she believes is right. She learns to balance her vulnerability with her determination, growing into a confident and assertive individual who stands up against injustice and fights for the truth. | The character arc for Erin is well-developed, showcasing her growth and transformation throughout the screenplay. However, there could be more emphasis on her internal struggles and emotional journey to make her character arc more impactful. Additionally, providing more depth to her relationships with other characters and exploring how they influence her growth could enhance the overall narrative. | To improve the character arc for Erin, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into her internal struggles and emotional vulnerabilities. Show her conflicting emotions and doubts more explicitly to highlight her growth and transformation. Additionally, explore how her relationships with other characters evolve and impact her journey, adding layers to her character development and making her arc more compelling. |
| George | George starts off as a supportive and caring neighbor who offers help and companionship to Erin and her children. As their relationship deepens, he becomes a patient and understanding partner to Erin, providing stability and comfort. However, as their relationship progresses, George begins to feel unappreciated and neglected, leading to a strained dynamic between them. This ultimately culminates in George deciding to leave, prioritizing his emotional well-being. | The character arc for George is well-developed and realistic, showcasing his evolution from a supportive figure to someone who prioritizes his own emotional well-being. However, the transition from a caring partner to someone who decides to leave could be further explored to provide more depth to George's decision-making process. Additionally, more emphasis could be placed on the emotional impact of George's departure on Erin and the children to create a more impactful resolution. | To improve the character arc, consider adding scenes that delve deeper into George's internal struggles and conflicting emotions as he grapples with feeling unappreciated in his relationship with Erin. Showcasing moments of introspection and vulnerability can help the audience empathize with George's decision to prioritize his emotional well-being. Additionally, explore the aftermath of George's departure on Erin and the children to highlight the impact of his absence and the emotional growth of the other characters. |
| Ed | Ed's character arc involves grappling with his own moral compass and sense of responsibility towards Erin. Initially skeptical and reluctant to take on challenging cases, he eventually recognizes Erin's determination and potential, leading him to stand by her in the pursuit of justice. He is torn between a lucrative settlement offer and doing what he believes is morally right, ultimately choosing integrity and justice over financial gain. | The character arc for Ed is well-developed, showcasing his transformation from a pragmatic and detached lawyer to a more empathetic and supportive figure. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggle between legal obligations and moral considerations. Additionally, more emphasis on his personal growth and the impact of his decisions on his own moral compass could enhance the character arc. | To improve the character arc for Ed, consider incorporating more internal monologues or reflective moments where he grapples with the ethical dilemmas he faces. Show more instances of him questioning his own beliefs and values, leading to a more profound transformation in his character. Additionally, explore his backstory or personal motivations further to provide a deeper understanding of his actions and decisions throughout the screenplay. |
| Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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| Environmental Justice | The film highlights the issue of environmental contamination and its impact on the health and well-being of a community. Erin's fight for justice against PG&E exposes the devastating consequences of corporate negligence and the need for accountability in environmental protection. | Environmental justice refers to the equitable distribution of environmental benefits and burdens, ensuring that no particular group bears a disproportionate share of environmental risks or harms. | ||||||||||||
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| Women Empowerment | Erin's character embodies resilience, determination, and a refusal to be undermined by societal expectations. Her journey from a single mother struggling to make ends meet to a successful legal advocate challenges gender stereotypes and empowers women to embrace their strength. | Women empowerment refers to promoting women's sense of self-worth, their ability to make choices, and their right to control their own lives. | ||||||||||||
| Corporate Greed and Accountability | The film exposes the unethical practices of PG&E, a corporation that prioritized profits over the health and safety of the community it served. Erin's relentless pursuit of justice highlights the importance of holding corporations accountable for their actions and ensuring they operate responsibly. | Corporate greed refers to the excessive pursuit of profits without regard for ethical or social consequences, while accountability involves holding corporations responsible for their actions and ensuring they operate in a manner that benefits society. | ||||||||||||
| Human Connection and Community | Despite the adversity she faces, Erin finds support and strength in her relationships with her family, friends, and the community she fights for. The film emphasizes the transformative power of human connection and the importance of collective action in overcoming challenges. | Human connection refers to the emotional and social bonds between individuals, while community involves a sense of belonging to a group and working together for common goals. | ||||||||||||
| Overcoming Adversity | Erin's journey is marked by countless obstacles and setbacks, from personal struggles to legal challenges. However, she demonstrates unwavering determination and resilience, constantly rising above adversity to fight for what is right. | Overcoming adversity refers to the ability to persevere and triumph over challenges, obstacles, and setbacks. | ||||||||||||
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
|---|---|
| internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolved from seeking legal help for a personal injury case to fighting for justice for the victims of toxic exposure. |
| External Goals | The protagonist's external goals evolved from providing for her family to uncovering evidence of corporate negligence and pursuing fair compensation for the victims. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the clash between personal integrity and systemic negligence in the pursuit of justice and accountability. |
Character Development Contribution: The evolving goals and conflicts contribute to the protagonist's growth from a struggling single mother to a determined advocate for justice, showcasing her resilience, empathy, and commitment to making a difference.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative forward by creating tension, challenges, and turning points, leading to a compelling journey of discovery, advocacy, and triumph over adversity.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts deepen the thematic exploration of justice, morality, corporate responsibility, and personal values, highlighting the complexities of navigating ethical dilemmas and fighting for what is right in a system that often prioritizes profit over people.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \
It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.
| Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | ||||
| 1 - Erin's Car Accident and Introduction to Masry & Vititoe | Sarcastic, Humorous, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 2 - Erin's Testimony | Defensive, Emotional, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 3 - A Mother's Desperation | Angry, Desperate, Depressed | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 4 - Confrontation and Employment | Defiant, Frustrated, Confrontational, Sympathetic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 5 - Erin's Chaotic Evening | Defiant, Sarcastic, Heartfelt | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 6 - Ed's Request and Erin's Struggle | Sarcastic, Frustrated, Defiant | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 7 - The Balancing Act | Tender, Resigned, Sarcastic | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 8 - Erin Brockovich's Investigation Begins | Serious, Informative, Inquisitive | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 9 - Chromium Concerns | Serious, Empathetic, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 10 - Uncovering the Truth | Suspenseful, Investigative, Informative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 11 - Erin's Discovery | Curious, Determined, Skeptical, Efficient | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 12 - A Day of Confrontations and Frustrations | Defiant, Frustrated, Confrontational, Resentful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 13 - Erin's Breakdown | Emotional, Intimate, Reflective, Frustrated | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 14 - Confrontation and Resolution | Serious, Confrontational, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 15 - Road Trip Conversations and Toxic Water Discovery | Suspenseful, Investigative, Concerned, Determined, Worrisome | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 16 - Confrontation and Denial at the Law Firm | Tense, Confrontational, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 17 - Ed's Fury and a Troubling Discovery | Tense, Emotional, Serious, Intense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 18 - The Road to a Settlement | Serious, Tense, Informative, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 19 - Erin's Determination to Fight for Justice | Serious, Intense, Emotional, Investigative | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 20 - Erin's Determination | Intense, Determined, Confrontational, Emotional | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 21 - Erin's Water Contamination Investigation | Suspenseful, Intense, Determined, Defiant | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 22 - A Day of Mixed Emotions | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 23 - Empathy and Discomfort | Intense, Emotional, Informative | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 24 - Ed and Erin's Collaboration and the Christmas Party | Intense, Emotional, Serious, Romantic, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 25 - Clash of Wills | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational, Intense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 26 - Erin's Suspicious Encounter | Intense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 27 - A Night of Conflict and Frustration | Tender, Reflective, Emotional, Introspective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 28 - Erin's Confrontation and Unforeseen Compensation | Angry, Frustrated, Defiant, Confrontational, Resentful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 29 - The Decision | Serious, Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 30 - Team Tension and Personal Conflict | Tense, Confrontational, Defiant, Intense | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 31 - Broken Windows and Heated Discussions | Tense, Emotional, Serious | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 32 - A Mother's Night of Turmoil | Angry, Emotional, Intense, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 33 - Erin's Illness | Serious, Tense, Regretful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8.5 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 34 - The Arbitration Conflict | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 35 - A Tense Meeting and a Desperate Call | Tense, Angry, Frustrated, Defiant, Determined | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 36 - A Glimmer of Understanding | Tense, Reflective, Emotional, Intimate | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 37 - Erin's Advocacy and Intriguing Encounter | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional, Intense, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 38 - Shredding the Truth: Erin Uncovers PG&E's Contamination Documents | Tense, Suspenseful, Confrontational, Revealing | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 39 - Reclamation and Redemption | Triumphant, Hopeful, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 40 - Unexpected Generosity | Tense, Confrontational, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Strong character development
- Emotional depth
- Engaging dialogue
- Tension-filled conflict
- Compelling plot development
Scene Weaknesses
- Some cliched moments
- Limited external conflict
- Repetitive dialogue
- Lack of character development in certain scenes
- Slightly predictable outcomes
Suggestions
- To minimize cliched moments, try subverting audience expectations and giving characters unexpected traits or plot developments
- To increase external conflict, consider expanding the setting or adding in additional characters or obstacles for the protagonist to face
- To combat repetitive dialogue, make sure each character has a distinct voice and way of speaking, and vary up the types of conversations they have
- To ensure consistent character development, make sure each scene has a clear purpose and objective for the character, and that their actions and decisions are in line with their established traits and motivations
- To avoid predictable outcomes, try introducing twists or surprises that shake up the story or challenge the characters' beliefs and plans
World Building
- Physical environment: The screenplay takes place in Southern California, in suburban areas, offices, courthouses, and rundown neighborhoods. The physical environment influences the characters' experiences by shaping their living conditions, their access to resources, and their exposure to pollution and health risks.
- Culture: The screenplay depicts a culture of resilience, determination, and struggle in the face of adversity. The characters come from various backgrounds and face different challenges, including financial difficulties, single parenthood, health issues, and corporate negligence.
- Society: The screenplay reflects the societal structures of economic disparities, gender roles, and power dynamics. The characters navigate complex social hierarchies, where their positions and relationships shape their opportunities and limitations.
- Technology: Technology plays a supporting role in the screenplay, with the presence of cars, phones, computers, and medical equipment. While technology provides convenience and facilitates communication, it also highlights the disparities in resources between different characters and communities.
- Characters influence: The world elements shape the characters' experiences and actions by providing the context for their struggles, motivations, and decisions. The physical environment influences their living conditions and exposure to hazards, the culture shapes their values and coping mechanisms, the society defines their roles and opportunities, and technology offers tools and resources that can both help and hinder their efforts.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by providing the backdrop for the events and conflicts of the screenplay. They create a sense of place, establish the characters' relationships with their surroundings, and provide obstacles and opportunities that drive the plot.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring issues of social justice, environmental responsibility, and the power of individuals to make a difference. They highlight the consequences of corporate negligence, the importance of community support, and the resilience of the human spirit.
| Voice Analysis | |
|---|---|
| Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and realistic dialogue, vivid descriptions, and a blend of humor and drama. The dialogue is direct, passionate, and emotionally charged, reflecting the characters' determination and resilience. The narrative is filled with tension, conflict, and emotional depth, highlighting the complexities of the characters' struggles and relationships. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by enhancing the authenticity and emotional impact of the characters' experiences. The sharp dialogue and realistic interactions create a sense of intimacy and relatability for the audience, drawing them into the characters' world. The blend of humor and drama adds depth and complexity to the characters, highlighting their conflicting personalities and motivations. |
| Best Representation Scene | 14 - Confrontation and Resolution |
| Best Scene Explanation | This scene could serve as the encapsulation of the writer's unique voice in the screenplay due to its sharp dialogue, nuanced character interactions, and thematic depth. The writer's voice is evident in every line, contributing to the scene's impact and meaning. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Emotional Intensity and Scene Length | Scenes with higher emotional impact tend to be shorter in length. |
| Dialogue and Emotional Impact | Scenes with more dialogue generally have a lower emotional impact, while scenes with less dialogue tend to have a higher emotional impact. |
| Characterization and Tone | Scenes with a more lighthearted tone tend to focus on character development, while scenes with a more serious tone tend to focus on plot. |
| Pacing and Tone | Scenes with a faster pace tend to have a more urgent or suspenseful tone, while scenes with a slower pace tend to have a more reflective or emotional tone. |
| Conflict and Emotional Impact | Scenes with more conflict tend to have a higher emotional impact. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
Based on the analysis of multiple scenes from the screenplay, it is evident that the writer possesses a strong grasp of storytelling techniques and has a knack for creating engaging and compelling narratives. The writing showcases a consistent level of quality, with well-developed characters, sharp dialogue, and well-paced plots. However, there are a few key areas where further improvement can enhance the overall impact and effectiveness of the screenplay.
Key Improvement Areas
Scene Structure and Pacing
Several scenes could benefit from a tighter structure and more efficient use of pacing. Some scenes tend to drag or lose focus, which can disrupt the flow of the narrative.
Character Development and Depth
While the characters are generally well-developed, some could benefit from greater depth and complexity. Exploring their inner motivations, backstories, and conflicts can make them more relatable and engaging for the audience.
Dialogue and Subtext
The dialogue is often strong and natural, but a few scenes could benefit from more subtext and emotional depth. Exploring what characters leave unsaid can add layers of meaning and create a more engaging experience for the audience.
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Book | Read 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into structuring scenes and developing characters, which can help improve the overall pacing and impact of the screenplay. |
| Screenplay | Study the screenplay of 'Erin Brockovich' by Susannah Grant | This screenplay is a well-written example of a character-driven legal drama that effectively develops its characters, explores complex themes, and maintains a strong narrative flow. |
| Video | Watch 'A Few Good Men' directed by Rob Reiner | This film showcases exceptional dialogue and character interactions within a legal setting, providing valuable lessons for crafting engaging and impactful dialogue. |
| Exercise | Practice writing scene outlines before drafting full scenesPractice In SceneProv | Outlining scenes helps ensure a clear structure, identify essential plot points, and prevent scenes from becoming bloated or unfocused. |
| Exercise | Conduct character interviews to develop their motivations and backstoriesPractice In SceneProv | Asking yourself questions about each character's past, fears, and desires can help flesh them out and create more well-rounded and relatable individuals. |
| Exercise | Write dialogue that reveals subtext and hidden meaningsPractice In SceneProv | Exploring what characters do not say explicitly can add depth and nuance to the dialogue, making it more engaging and thought-provoking for the audience. |
Additional Notes:
Overall, the screenplay showcases the writer's promising talent for storytelling. By addressing the highlighted areas for improvement and consistently practicing the suggested exercises, the writer can refine their craft, enhance the impact of their narratives, and captivate audiences with even more compelling and memorable screenplays.
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Damsel in Distress | Erin is in a car accident and is injured, leaving her vulnerable and in need of help. | A damsel in distress is a female character who is placed in a difficult or dangerous situation and relies on a male character to save her. An example of this trope is Princess Peach in the Mario video game series. |
| 鱼rsonal Transformation | Erin starts out as a single mother struggling to make ends meet, but through her work on the PG&E case, she transforms into a confident and successful woman. | Personal transformation is a trope where a character undergoes a significant change in personality, appearance, or both. An example of this trope is Ebenezer Scrooge in the novel A Christmas Carol. |
| Fish Out of Water | Erin is a single mother and waitress who is suddenly thrust into the world of law and high-stakes litigation. | Fish out of water is a trope where a character is placed in an unfamiliar or uncomfortable environment. An example of this trope is Forrest Gump in the 1994 film of the same name. |
| The Power of One | Erin is the only one who believes in the case against PG&E and is willing to fight for the plaintiffs. | The power of one is a trope where a single individual makes a difference against all odds. An example of this trope is Mahatma Gandhi in the 1982 film Gandhi. |
| The Power of Love | Erin's relationship with George helps her to overcome her personal and professional challenges. | The power of love is a trope where love conquers all. An example of this trope is Romeo and Juliet in the 1597 play of the same name. |
| The Power of Friendship | Erin's friends and colleagues help her to fight for the plaintiffs. | The power of friendship is a trope where a group of friends overcome challenges together. An example of this trope is the Scooby-Doo gang in the Scooby-Doo cartoon series. |
| The Power of Belief | Erin believes in the plaintiffs' case and is willing to fight for them, even when the odds are stacked against her. | The power of belief is a trope where a character's belief in something gives them the strength to overcome challenges. An example of this trope is Luke Skywalker in the Star Wars film series. |
| The Power of Knowledge | Erin's knowledge of the law and the facts of the case helps her to win. | The power of knowledge is a trope where a character's knowledge gives them the advantage in a situation. An example of this trope is Sherlock Holmes in the Sherlock Holmes novel series. |
| The Power of Will | Erin's determination and willpower help her to overcome the challenges she faces. | The power of will is a trope where a character's determination and willpower help them to overcome challenges. An example of this trope is Rocky Balboa in the Rocky film series. |
| The Power of Courage | Erin's courage helps her to stand up for what she believes in, even when it is difficult. | The power of courage is a trope where a character's courage helps them to overcome challenges. An example of this trope is Atticus Finch in the novel To Kill a Mockingbird. |
Memorable lines in the script:
| Scene Number | Line |
|---|---|
| 28 | Erin: I want my fucking money |
| 20 | Erin: I know the difference between right and wrong! |
| 21 | Erin: People are dying, Ross. You got document after document here, right under your nose, that says why, and you haven't said word one about it. I wanna know how the hell you sleep at night. |
| 4 | Erin: I'm not everyone else, Mr. Masry. I'm someone you made promises to that you didn't deliver on. I trusted you. With my kids' well-being. Now, I'm smart, and I'm hard-working, and I'll do anything. But if you think I'm leaving here without a job, you got another thing coming. |
| 16 | Ed: I will present your offer to my clients. I doubt they'll accept it. |
Some Loglines to consider:
| A determined single mother fights for justice against a negligent company by uncovering their cover-up. |
| Erin Brockovich takes on a powerful energy company to prove their negligence and achieve victory in court. |
| Through hard work and perseverance, Erin Brockovich inspires others to fight for justice in the face of adversity. |
| Despite facing mistrust among plaintiffs, Erin Brockovich convinces them to sign release forms for a potential settlement. |
| Inspired by a car accident, Erin Brockovich takes matters into her own hands and demands a job at a law firm to expose a cover-up and fight for justice. |
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The scene-by-scene analysis will demonstrate how each scene performs across various criteria, summarized in the column headings.
Click on any scene title to view the full analysis, including critiques and suggestions for improvement.
'Other Analyses' provides various insights into your writing and different perspectives, although it might not lead to significant rewrites of your script.
After that, the high-level menu will offer insights into the story, themes, and characters.
The scene-by-scene analysis will demonstrate how each scene performs across various criteria, summarized in the column headings.
Click on any scene title to view the full analysis, including critiques and suggestions for improvement.
'Other Analyses' provides various insights into your writing and different perspectives, although it might not lead to significant rewrites of your script.
Click on the Print Analysis link in the left menu. You can then print to PDF or save it as PDF.
Click the Scene Analysis link on the left menu. Next to each scene title you can click "improve". In the improve page you can select any scene from your script to work on.
Yes. You own the rights to your script. We do not claim any ownership of your script. We're simply using it to generate the analysis.
No. We do not use your script to train our AI. The AI uses your script to generate the analysis and nothing else.
SceneProv is a game that helps you improve your craft.
You can play it for free. If you have scripts analyzed, the AI might recommend exercises from SceneProv to help you improve your writing. Go to the craft tab to see what it recommended.
Let the AI take a turn when you're blocked or you want to riff on a scene. Each scene you create in SceneProv gets graded at the end.
You can play it for free. If you have scripts analyzed, the AI might recommend exercises from SceneProv to help you improve your writing. Go to the craft tab to see what it recommended.
Let the AI take a turn when you're blocked or you want to riff on a scene. Each scene you create in SceneProv gets graded at the end.
The maximum length of a screenplay is 160 pages.
Unfortunately it's a known issue for the time being. Fixing this is on the roadmap.
If you're having trouble uploading your script, please email us at 'help@scriptreader.ai'
The goal of ScriptReader.ai is not 100% comprehension, but rather to assist you in improving your script and craft. The valuable insights should still be many. ScriptReader.ai is a tool with a bit of getting used to. We're trying to make the learning curve as easy as possible. If you have any suggestions, please email us at suggestions@scriptreader.ai
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- The email might have gone to your spam folder or is hidden in an email thread.
- The process might still be ongoing. Register/Login with the email you used during upload and look at the status. It sometimes takes as long as a couple hours. If it's been longer than that email us at help@scriptreader.ai
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Engine: Claude
Recommend
Explanation: The screenplay for 'Erin Brockovich' is a well-crafted and engaging drama that tells the true story of a determined legal assistant who helps a community take on a powerful corporation. The protagonist, Erin Brockovich, is a complex and compelling character whose personal journey drives the narrative forward. The screenplay effectively balances the larger legal/environmental conflict with the individual struggles of the characters, creating a sense of authenticity and high stakes. While the supporting characters could be further developed in some areas, the overall pacing and dialogue are strong, and the screenplay's exploration of themes such as justice and corporate power make it a compelling and relevant story that would appeal to a wide audience.
Engine: GPT4
Recommend
Explanation: The screenplay of 'Erin Brockovich' offers a compelling narrative centered around a strong female protagonist, Erin, who evolves significantly throughout the story. The character development, combined with sharp dialogue and a well-structured plot, makes this screenplay stand out. While it could benefit from further development of secondary characters and simplification of legal terms, its strengths in creating a gripping legal drama with emotional depth are notable.