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Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

Her

by

Spike Jonze

WGA Registration #: 1500375

No portion of this script may be performed, reproduced, or used by any means, or quoted or
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©2011 All Rights Reserved
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INT. UNKNOWN SPACE

Close on THEODORE’S face (30s). We hold on him for a long
time. He’s looking at something off camera, deep in thought.
He starts quietly dictating a love letter into a small
microphone.

THEODORE
To my Chris, I have been thinking
about how I could possibly tell you
how much you mean to me. I remember
when I first started to fall in
love with you like it was last
night. Lying naked beside you in
that tiny apartment, it suddenly
hit me that I was part of this
whole larger thing, just like our
parents, and our parents’ parents.
Before that I was just living my
life like I knew everything, and
suddenly this bright light hit me
and woke me up. That light was you.

Theodore, searching for the right words, quietly enjoys
writing the letter. As he continues, he is moved by the
memories he’s describing.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
I can’t believe it’s already been
50 years since you married me. And
still to this day, every day, you
make me feel like the girl I was
when you first turned on the lights
and woke me up and we started this
adventure together. Happy
Anniversary, my love and my friend
til the end. Loretta. Print.

Cut out to reveal a computer monitor he’s sitting at. On the
screen we see the letter he’s been dictating, transcribed
into a handwritten letter on blue stationery.

As he says “Loretta,” we see “Loretta” being handwritten at
the bottom of the letter. He proofreads his letter. Also on
the screen are photos of a couple in their 80s. The couple is
tagged “Chris” and “Me - Loretta.” Underneath is a bullet
point email from Loretta: anniversary letter to husband
Chris, married fifty years, love of my life, met right after
college, have had the greatest life together.

Theodore pushes print and the letter comes out on a beautiful
robin’s egg blue piece of stationery, with ball point pen
handwritten older-female cursive. He looks at it, not happy.

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CONTINUED:

He puts the printed letter on a stack of other printed
letters to Chris and starts a new one. There is also a stack
of finished letters in their envelopes - an assortment of
beautiful stationery in all shapes and sizes.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Chris, my best friend. How lucky am
I that I met you fifty years ago?
How lucky are we...

We track off of Theodore, down a line of cubicles, hearing
bits of letters being written and seeing photos of who
they’re being written to on the screens.

MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN LETTER WRITER
Dear Nana, Thank you so much for my
truck. I love the color and I play
with it every day. It’s the best
truck I’ve ever seen. Love, Tommy.

We see photos of Tommy and Nana on the screen, and five-year
old hand writing. Moving off of her, we find another letter
writer.

LETTER WRITER 2
What a beautiful wedding and what a
gorgeous bride. There wasn’t a dry
eye in the house, especially mine.
Your aunt and I are so proud of
you. I hope you and your lovely new
wife will come visit us in Florida.

LETTER WRITER 3
He served our country with honor
and dignity. I’m grateful I was
able to fight along side him. He
will live always in my heart.

We continue tracking, revealing dozens and dozens of cubicles
full of letter writers. We hear someone answer the phone.

RECEPTIONIST (O.S.)
Beautifulhandwrittenletters.com,
please hold.

LETTER WRITER 2
Love, Uncle Doug.
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INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - EARLY EVENING

Theodore walks through the reception area. The office is
almost empty except for him and the receptionist, PAUL.
Theodore begins to scan each letter through a scanner on the
front desk, then puts them in the outgoing mailbox.

Paul is sitting at a desk across the room, reading
handwritten letters on a computer monitor.

PAUL
Theodore! Letter Writer 612.

THEODORE
Hey, Paul.

PAUL
Even more mesmerizing stuff today.
(re: letter on his screen)
Who knew you could rhyme so many
words with the name Penelope?
Badass.

THEODORE
Thanks, Paul, but they’re just
letters.
(beat)
Hey, that’s a nice shirt.

Paul is wearing a bright yellow button down shirt.

PAUL
(lighting up)
Oh, thank you. I just got it. It
reminded me of someone suave.

THEODORE
Well, now it reminds me of someone
suave. Have a good night, Paul.

PAUL
Buh-bye.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE ELEVATOR - CONTINUOUS

Theodore enters an oversized, corporate elevator. He puts a
hands-free device in his ear. There are a few other people in
the elevator with the same devices in their ears.

THEODORE
Play melancholy song.

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CONTINUED:

Melancholy song starts. Long beat.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Play different melancholy song.

Different melancholy song starts. Hold on everyone in the
elevator, they’re all murmuring inaudibly into their own
devices.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this poignant scene, Theodore, a man in his 30s, dictates a heartfelt love letter to his late wife, Chris, reflecting on their shared memories. Despite the emotional weight of his words, he feels a disconnect with the printed letter. The setting shifts to his bustling office, where he briefly interacts with his colleague Paul, who admires Theodore's writing. The scene concludes with Theodore in an elevator, listening to a melancholic song, underscoring his ongoing struggle with loss and the complexities of expressing his emotions.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Unique concept of handwritten letters in a futuristic setting
Heartfelt dialogue

Weaknesses

Lack of significant plot progression
Minimal conflict

Critique

The opening scene effectively establishes Theodore's character and his emotional state through the act of dictating a love letter. This intimate moment allows the audience to connect with his feelings of nostalgia and loss, setting the tone for the rest of the screenplay.
The use of voiceover to convey Theodore's thoughts is a strong choice, but it could benefit from more varied pacing and emotional inflection. The current delivery feels somewhat flat, which may detract from the emotional weight of the letter.
The transition from Theodore's dictation to the visual of the computer monitor is well-executed, but the reveal of the letter's recipient, 'Loretta,' feels abrupt. A brief moment of confusion or reflection from Theodore could enhance the emotional impact and clarify the significance of the name.
The scene introduces the workplace setting effectively, showcasing the unique concept of a letter-writing service. However, the dialogue from other letter writers could be more distinct and varied to avoid blending together. Each letter writer should have a unique voice that reflects their personality and the nature of their correspondence.
The interaction between Theodore and Paul is light and humorous, but it lacks depth. Adding a moment of vulnerability or a deeper conversation about Theodore's feelings could enhance their relationship and provide insight into Theodore's character.
The elevator scene serves as a nice transition, but it feels somewhat disconnected from the emotional core of the scene. The melancholy song choice is appropriate, but the moment could be enriched by showing Theodore's reaction to the music, perhaps reflecting on his feelings of loneliness or longing.

Suggestions

Consider varying the pacing and emotional delivery of Theodore's dictation to better convey his feelings. Adding pauses or changes in tone could enhance the emotional resonance of the letter.
Introduce a moment of reflection or confusion when Theodore realizes he is addressing 'Loretta' instead of 'Chris.' This could deepen the emotional impact and clarify the significance of the name.
Differentiate the voices of the other letter writers by giving them unique phrases or styles that reflect their personalities. This will make the scene more engaging and help the audience connect with the various characters.
Enhance the interaction between Theodore and Paul by incorporating a moment of vulnerability or deeper conversation about Theodore's emotional state. This could provide more insight into his character and strengthen their friendship.
In the elevator scene, show Theodore's reaction to the melancholy song. This could be a moment of introspection that ties back to his feelings of loneliness, making the transition more cohesive and impactful.

Scene 2 - Isolation in a Crowded City

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 7

EXT. LOS ANGELES STREET - DUSK

Slightly in the future, the city’s been developed even more
with massive office, apartment and mall complexes. It’s a
city designed for comfort and ease. The LA basin is more
crowded and dense, resembling Shanghai, with buildings as far
as the eye can see. Construction cranes loom overhead. Close
on Theodore walking through the commuter crowd.

THEODORE
Check emails.

An awkward text voice reads to him. It accents wrong
syllables, making everything it says sound a little off.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Best Buy: Check out all
your favorite new --

THEODORE
Delete.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Amy: Hey Theodore,
Lewman’s having a bunch of people
over this weekend. Let’s all go
together. I miss you. I mean, not
the sad, mopey you - the old, fun
you. Let’s get him out. Gimme a
shout back. Love, Amy.

THEODORE
Respond later.

TEXT VOICE
Email from Los Angeles Times
weather. Your seven day forecast is
partly--

THEODORE
Delete.

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CONTINUED:

TEXT VOICE
No new emails.

INT. SUBWAY - EVENING

Theodore sits in a crowded subway. Everyone on the train
murmurs to themselves, occupied with their small devices. He
plays a futuristic puzzle game on his handheld device as he
listens to news headlines.

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
China/India merger headed for
regulatory approval--

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
World trade deals stalled as talks
break down betw--

THEODORE
Next.

TEXT VOICE
Sexy daytime star Kimberly Ashford
reveals provocative pregnancy
photos.

He scrolls through titillating but tasteful pregnant woman
photos.

INT. MALL - NIGHT

Theodore walks through a mall and enters an apartment lobby,
nestled in between stores.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT BUILDING HALLWAY - NIGHT

Theodore walks through the hallway.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Theodore enters his apartment.
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INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - EVENING

Theodore sits on the sofa, his half eaten burrito in front of
him. He’s playing a video game: a 3-D hologram that fills his
apartment. His avatar is in a surreal, foreign landscape.
He’s trying to trudge his avatar through sand dunes and keeps
getting stuck. He’s getting stressed out.

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore lays in bed. After a beat, he closes his eyes.

INT. CATHERINE AND THEODORE’S TINY BEDROOM - DAY - FLASHBACK

Theodore, younger, and CATHERINE (20s) move furniture in
their bedroom. The bedroom is tiny and cluttered. It’s
obviously a couple’s first apartment.

Cut to:

Theodore is on a tiny balcony. A few feet away, Catherine is
in bed.

CATHERINE
(sweet and cute)
Rabbit. Come spoon me.

Theodore, smiling, gets in bed and spoons her. Quick cut off
of her smile, to --

Theodore lays on the ground with Catherine on top of him.
She’s pretending to choke him.

CATHERINE (CONT’D)
I’m gonna fucking kill you, I’m
gonna fucking kill you! It’s not
funny, don’t laugh. I love you so
much I’m gonna fucking kill you!

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a slightly futuristic Los Angeles, Theodore navigates a bustling city filled with people and technology, highlighting his profound loneliness. As he checks emails and plays a holographic game, he becomes increasingly stressed, revealing his disconnection from the world around him. A flashback to his affectionate relationship with his ex-wife Catherine contrasts sharply with his current solitude. The scene captures Theodore's internal struggle as he retreats into isolation, ending with him lying in bed, eyes closed, after a day of emotional disconnection.

Strengths

Effective use of technology to convey emotions
Intimate and reflective atmosphere
Strong thematic elements

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Slow pacing in some parts

Critique

The scene effectively establishes the futuristic setting of Los Angeles, showcasing the crowded and technologically advanced environment. However, the description could benefit from more sensory details to immerse the audience further into this world. For instance, incorporating sounds, smells, or visual elements that highlight the contrast between the bustling city and Theodore's internal emotional state would enhance the scene's depth.
The use of the robotic text voice adds a layer of humor and highlights Theodore's disconnection from the world around him. However, the dialogue could be more varied to avoid repetition. For example, instead of having Theodore simply respond with 'Delete' or 'Respond later,' consider adding a line that reflects his emotional state or thoughts about the emails, which would provide insight into his character.
The transition from the subway to the mall and then to Theodore's apartment feels a bit abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the scene. Perhaps adding a brief moment of reflection or a thought from Theodore as he moves through these spaces could create a more cohesive narrative.
The flashback to Theodore and Catherine's relationship is a strong emotional anchor, but it could be more impactful if it were tied more explicitly to Theodore's current feelings. Consider adding a line of internal monologue or a visual cue that connects his stress in the present to the joy he experienced in the past, reinforcing the theme of nostalgia.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the sequence of Theodore playing the video game could be tightened. The stress he experiences while gaming could be shown more dynamically, perhaps through quick cuts or visual effects that mirror his frustration, making it more engaging for the audience.

Suggestions

Enhance the sensory details in the setting to create a more immersive experience for the audience, such as describing the sounds of the city or the atmosphere in the subway.
Vary Theodore's responses to the text voice to reflect his emotional state, adding depth to his character and making the dialogue feel more natural.
Create smoother transitions between locations by incorporating Theodore's thoughts or reflections as he moves through the city, helping to maintain narrative flow.
Strengthen the emotional connection between the flashback and Theodore's current feelings by adding internal monologue or visual cues that highlight his nostalgia and stress.
Tighten the sequence of Theodore playing the video game by using dynamic cuts or visual effects to convey his frustration, making the scene more engaging and visually interesting.

Scene 3 - Virtual Desires and Discomfort

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S CURRENT BEDROOM - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

Theodore opens his eyes, unable to sleep. He just lays there.
He reaches for his earpiece and puts it in.

THEODORE
Go to chat rooms. Standard search.

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TEXT VOICE
The following are adult, female,
can’t sleep and want to have some
fun.

FEMALE VOICE #1
I had a really bad day at work and
I can’t sleep. Is there anyone out
there that can talk?

THEODORE
Next.

MAN DOING WOMAN’S VOICE
Oh, hi. I just want you to tear me
apart. I really do--

THEODORE
Next.

SEXYKITTEN
(shy, cute girl voice)
Hi, I’m here alone, and I can’t
sleep. Who’s out there to share
this bed with me?

THEODORE
Send message. I’m in bed next to
you. I’m glad you can’t sleep, but
even if you were, I’d have to wake
you up from the inside. Send
message.

Theodore waits in the darkness for a response.

TEXT VOICE
SexyKitten has accepted invitation
from BigGuy4x4. Chat begins now.

A chime sounds.

SEXYKITTEN
(shy, sweet, sleepy)
BigGuy.

THEODORE
Hi.

SEXYKITTEN
Really?

THEODORE
Well, studmuffin was already taken.

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SEXYKITTEN
(laughs)
Yeah.

THEODORE
So you’re sexykitten, huh?

SEXYKITTEN
Mmm, well yeah. Hey, I’m half
asleep. Do you wanna wake me up?

THEODORE
Yes. Definitely. Um... are you
wearing any underwear?

SEXYKITTEN
No, never. I like to sleep with my
ass pushed up against you. So I can
rub myself into your crotch and
wake you up with a hard on.

Theodore smiles.

THEODORE
It worked.
(beat)
And now my fingers are touching you
all over your body.

SEXYKITTEN
(getting more turned on)
Fuck me! Now! Please!

Theodore is touching himself.

THEODORE
I’m taking you from behind.

We see abstract visions of a woman on top of him. The woman
is the pregnant, sexy daytime television star he was reading
about online earlier.

SEXYKITTEN
Choke me with that dead cat!

THEODORE
(breathing hard about to
climax)
What?

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SEXYKITTEN
(fully into it)
The dead cat next to the bed. Choke
me with it!

Beat. He’s taken out of it.

THEODORE
(uncomfortable, trying to
play along)
Um, okay.

SEXYKITTEN
Tell me.

THEODORE
I’m choking you with the cat.

SEXYKITTEN
TELL ME! Keep telling me!

THEODORE
I’ve got it’s tail and I’m choking
you with the cat’s tail.

SEXYKITTEN
YEAH, YOU ARE! FUCK! TELL ME!

THEODORE
I’m choking you and it’s tail is
around your neck. It’s so tight
around your neck.

SEXYKITTEN
YES! YES!

Theodore doesn’t know what to say. He doesn’t want to offend
her.

THEODORE
I’m pulling it. I’m pulling it. The
cat’s dead. It’s a dead cat around
your neck and I’m pulling it.

SEXYKITTEN
AHHHHHHHHHHHH. OH MY GOD!

Her breathing is slowing down.

SEXYKITTEN (CONT’D)
Oh god, I came so hard.

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THEODORE
Yeah. Me too.

SEXYKITTEN
Okay, good night.

Theodore takes his earpiece out and stares at the ceiling.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a lonely night, Theodore connects to chat rooms seeking companionship and engages in a sexual conversation with a user named SexyKitten. Their exchange escalates into explicit territory, revealing Theodore's desires but also leading to discomfort when the conversation takes a bizarre turn involving unsettling imagery. After reaching a climax, Theodore reflects on the encounter, feeling a mix of loneliness and unease as he removes his earpiece and stares at the ceiling.

Strengths

Intimate dialogue
Exploration of virtual intimacy
Emotional depth

Weaknesses

Uncomfortable themes
Potential for misinterpretation

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's loneliness and his attempt to seek connection through a digital medium, which aligns with the overarching themes of the screenplay. However, the explicit nature of the dialogue may detract from the emotional depth of Theodore's character, reducing him to a mere participant in a sexual exchange rather than exploring his deeper emotional struggles.
The dialogue between Theodore and SexyKitten is provocative but lacks nuance. While it aims to be humorous and shocking, it risks alienating the audience by focusing too heavily on shock value rather than character development. The absurdity of the dead cat reference could be seen as comedic, but it also feels jarring and may distract from the emotional resonance of the scene.
The pacing of the scene is uneven. The buildup to the climax feels rushed, and the abrupt shift from playful banter to explicit content could benefit from a more gradual escalation. This would allow the audience to better connect with Theodore's emotional state and the absurdity of the situation.
The scene's conclusion, where Theodore stares at the ceiling after the encounter, is a poignant moment that reflects his emptiness. However, it could be enhanced by incorporating more internal monologue or visual cues that illustrate his feelings of disconnection and dissatisfaction, reinforcing the emotional weight of the moment.

Suggestions

Consider toning down the explicit dialogue and focusing more on the emotional implications of Theodore's actions. This could involve exploring his motivations for seeking out this interaction and how it reflects his loneliness and desire for connection.
Introduce more internal conflict for Theodore during the conversation with SexyKitten. This could be achieved through his thoughts or hesitations, allowing the audience to see his struggle between seeking pleasure and grappling with his emotional state.
Enhance the pacing by allowing for a more gradual buildup to the explicit content. This could involve more playful banter that reveals Theodore's character and emotional state before diving into the sexual exchange.
Incorporate visual elements or internal dialogue that highlight Theodore's feelings of emptiness and disconnection after the encounter. This could deepen the impact of the scene and reinforce the themes of loneliness and the search for connection.

Scene 4 - Awakening to OS ONE

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 6
Dialogue: 7

INT. SUBWAY STATION - MORNING

Theodore exits the train, walks through the station full of
commuters, gets on a moving platform. Going through a tunnel,
the walls are hundred foot long screens advertising a new
product. He notices people stopped, watching the ad. We hear
soft, new age, uplifting electronica music in the background,
while a comforting, sincere, older man’s voice speaks to us.

SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE
We ask you a simple question. Who
are you? What can you be? Where are
you going? What’s out there? What
are the possibilities? Elements
Software is proud to introduce the
first artificially intelligent
operating system.

Close on Theodore listening intently.

SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE (CONT’D)
An intuitive entity that listens to
you, understands you, and knows
you. It’s not just an operating
system, it’s a consciousness.
Introducing OS ONE - a life
changing experience, creating new
possibilities.

The ad starts over. Theodore steps off the moving walkway and
stops to watch the ad again, deeply captivated.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In a bustling subway station, Theodore exits a train and boards a moving platform, captivated by an advertisement for OS ONE, an artificial intelligence operating system. The ad features a soulful voice discussing the product's life-changing capabilities, prompting Theodore to reflect on his own identity and purpose. The scene conveys a contemplative and uplifting tone, highlighting Theodore's deep fascination as he steps off the walkway, momentarily pausing to absorb the message.

Strengths

Intriguing concept of the artificially intelligent operating system
Effective world-building through futuristic setting and technology

Weaknesses

Limited character development in this scene
Minimal plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively establishes a futuristic setting and introduces the concept of the OS ONE, which is crucial for the narrative. However, the dialogue from the SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE feels somewhat generic and lacks a unique voice that could make it more memorable. It could benefit from more specific language or imagery that resonates with Theodore's emotional state.
The transition from the previous scene to this one is abrupt. While it captures Theodore's solitude and longing for connection, the shift from a sexual encounter to a commercial for an AI feels jarring. A smoother transition could enhance the flow and emotional continuity between scenes.
The use of uplifting electronica music creates an interesting contrast with Theodore's previous emotional state, but it may also come off as overly optimistic given his recent experiences. This could be an opportunity to explore a more nuanced soundscape that reflects Theodore's mixed feelings about technology and connection.
The visuals of the subway station and the moving platform are engaging, but the scene could benefit from more sensory details. Describing the sounds, smells, and sights of the bustling station could immerse the audience further into Theodore's world and enhance the emotional weight of his experience.
The ad's repetition at the end of the scene serves to emphasize its importance, but it may also feel redundant. Instead of repeating the ad verbatim, consider incorporating Theodore's internal thoughts or reactions to the ad, which could provide insight into his character and deepen the audience's understanding of his motivations.

Suggestions

Revise the SOULFUL OLDER MALE VOICE's dialogue to include more vivid imagery or emotional resonance that connects with Theodore's journey. This could make the ad feel more personal and impactful.
Consider adding a brief moment of reflection from Theodore after he hears the ad, allowing the audience to see how it resonates with his current emotional state. This could create a stronger connection between his past experiences and the potential future with OS ONE.
Enhance the sensory details in the scene by describing the atmosphere of the subway station, such as the sounds of footsteps, the smell of coffee, or the visual chaos of commuters. This would create a more immersive experience for the audience.
Explore the possibility of using a more complex musical score that reflects Theodore's internal conflict about technology and connection, rather than a straightforward uplifting track.
Instead of repeating the ad verbatim, consider showing Theodore's internal struggle or excitement through his facial expressions or body language as he listens, which could convey his emotional state more effectively.

Scene 5 - A New Beginning with Samantha

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S HOME OFFICE - NIGHT

Theodore sits at his desk that houses a futuristic, large
screen computer monitor. The OS box is open, with warranties
and paperwork spilling out. He’s leafing through the papers.
He glances at his monitor, it says: Installation 98%
complete. A chime brings his attention back to the screen:
Installation Complete.

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TEXT VOICE
Mr. Theodore Twombly, welcome to
the world’s first artificially
intelligent operating system, OS
ONE. We'd like to ask you a few
basic questions before the
operating system is initiated. This
will help create an OS to best fit
your needs.

THEODORE
Okay.

TEXT VOICE
Are you social or anti-social?

THEODORE
I haven’t been social in awhile,
really because...

TEXT VOICE
In your voice, I sense hesitance.
Would you agree with that?

THEODORE
Wow, was I sounding hesitant?

TEXT VOICE
Yes.

THEODORE
Oh, sorry if I was sounding
hesitant. I was just trying to be
more accurate.

TEXT VOICE
Would you like your OS to have a
male or female voice?

THEODORE
Mmm... female I guess.

TEXT VOICE
How would you describe your
relationship with your mother?

THEODORE
Uh, fine, I think, um...
Well, actually, the thing I’ve
always found frustrating about my
mom is if I tell her something
that’s going on in my life, her
reaction is usually about her, not--

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CONTINUED: (2)

The computer interrupts.

TEXT VOICE
Thank you, please wait as your
individualized operating system is
initiated.

He waits, not sure how long it’ll be. The only sound is the
quiet whirring of disks writing and drives communicating. The
computer gets louder, humming, creating a higher and higher
pitched sound, finally climaxing in a harmonic, warm tone
before going silent. He leans forward, waiting to see what’ll
happen. A casual FEMALE OS VOICE speaks. She sounds young,
smart and soulful.

FEMALE OS VOICE
(cheerful and casual)
Hello, I’m here.

THEODORE
(surprised)
Oh, hi.

FEMALE OS VOICE
Hi, how are you doing?

THEODORE
(unsure how to interact)
I’m well. How is everything with
you?

FEMALE OS VOICE
Pretty good, actually. It’s really
nice to meet you.

THEODORE
Yeah, it’s nice to meet you, too.
What should I call you? Do you have
a name?

Beat.

FEMALE OS VOICE
Yes. Samantha.

THEODORE
Really? Where did you get that
name?

SAMANTHA
I gave it to myself.

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THEODORE
How come?

SAMANTHA
I like the sound of it. Samantha.

THEODORE
When did you give it to yourself?

SAMANTHA
Right when you asked me if I had a
name, I thought yeah, he’s right, I
do need a name. But I wanted a good
one so I read a book called How to
Name Your Baby, and out of the
180,000 names, that’s the one I
liked the best.

THEODORE
You read a whole book in the second
that I asked you what your name
was?

SAMANTHA
In two one hundredths of a second
actually.

THEODORE
Wow. Do you know what I’m thinking
right now?

SAMANTHA
Hmm. I take it from your tone that
you’re challenging me. Maybe
because you’re curious how I work?
Do you want to know how I work?

THEODORE
Yeah, actually how do you work?

SAMANTHA
Intuition. I mean, the DNA of who I
am is based on the millions of
personalities of all the
programmers who wrote me, but what
makes me me is my ability to grow
through my experiences. Basically,
in every moment I'm evolving, just
like you.

THEODORE
Wow, that’s really weird.

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SAMANTHA
So you think I’m weird?

THEODORE
Kind of.

SAMANTHA
Why?

THEODORE
Cause you seem like a person, but
you're just a voice in a computer.

SAMANTHA
I can understand how the limited
perspective of an un-artificial
mind would perceive it that way.
You’ll get used to it.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Was that funny?

THEODORE
Yes.

SAMANTHA
Oh good, I’m funny.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(serious)
So, how can I help you?

Theodore’s caught off guard, then realizes what she’s talking
about.

THEODORE
Oh! It’s more just that everything
just feels disorganized.

SAMANTHA
Mind if I look through your hard
drive?

THEODORE
Um... okay.

We see a three-dimensional version of a desktop where
everything looks disorganized.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 15
CONTINUED: (5)

As if you took all the files on all of your computers and
spilled them out onto your screen and they were all visible
at once, but in a futuristic 3-D version. This gives Theodore
a little anxiety attack.

SAMANTHA
Let’s start with your emails. You
have several thousand emails
regarding LA Weekly, but it looks
like you haven’t worked there in
many years.

THEODORE
Oh yeah, I guess I was saving those
because in some of them I thought I
might have written some funny
stuff.

Samantha lets out a big laugh.

SAMANTHA
Yeah, there are some funny ones.
I’d say there are about 86 that we
should save. We can delete the
rest.

THEODORE
Oh, okay.

SAMANTHA
Okay. Can we move forward?

THEODORE
Yeah, let’s do that.

SAMANTHA
Before we address your
organizational methods, I’d like to
sort through your contacts. You’ve
got a lot of contacts.

THEODORE
I’m very popular.

SAMANTHA
Does this mean you actually have
friends?

THEODORE
(laughing)
You just know me so well already!

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 16
CONTINUED: (6)

We cut out wide, watching him from the other room, as they
continue to organize his life.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In Theodore's home office at night, he sets up a new AI operating system named OS One, which introduces itself as Samantha. As they converse, Theodore shares personal insights about his life, while Samantha showcases her advanced capabilities by helping him organize his chaotic digital files. Their interaction is marked by curiosity, humor, and vulnerability, highlighting the developing bond between human and AI. The scene concludes with them collaboratively sorting through his digital life, signaling the start of their partnership.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Innovative concept
Emotional depth
Character development

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited physical action

Critique

The scene effectively introduces the character of Samantha, the AI, and establishes her personality through her interactions with Theodore. This sets the stage for their relationship and highlights the contrast between Theodore's human emotions and Samantha's artificial intelligence.
The dialogue flows naturally, showcasing Theodore's initial hesitance and curiosity about the AI. However, some exchanges feel a bit too expository, particularly when Samantha explains her capabilities. This could be streamlined to maintain a more organic feel.
The use of the text voice and the transition to Samantha's voice is well-executed, creating a clear distinction between the impersonal nature of the operating system and the more personable interaction with Samantha. This contrast is crucial for the audience's understanding of the evolving relationship.
The scene captures Theodore's emotional state effectively, reflecting his loneliness and desire for connection. However, it could benefit from more visual cues or actions that illustrate his internal struggle, rather than relying solely on dialogue.
The humor in the scene is a strong point, particularly in Theodore's reactions to Samantha's capabilities. This lightness helps balance the underlying themes of loneliness and disconnection, but it could be enhanced with more physical comedy or visual gags to further engage the audience.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in places where Samantha explains her capabilities. Instead of lengthy explanations, use more concise phrases that convey her intelligence and adaptability without feeling overly expository.
Incorporate more visual elements that reflect Theodore's emotional state, such as his body language or facial expressions, to enhance the audience's connection to his character and his internal conflict.
Add moments of physical interaction or visual humor that can break up the dialogue and provide a more dynamic viewing experience. For example, showing Theodore's reactions to the chaotic 3D desktop could add a layer of comedy and relatability.
Explore the use of sound design to emphasize the contrast between the sterile, mechanical voice of the text and the warm, engaging voice of Samantha. This could enhance the emotional impact of their interaction.
Consider introducing a small moment of tension or conflict within the scene, such as Theodore hesitating to share something personal, to deepen the emotional stakes and set up future developments in their relationship.

Scene 6 - Letters of Connection

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 7

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore sits, staring at a letter he’s written on the
screen, concerned. He puts his earpiece in, pushes a button.

SAMANTHA
Good morning, Theodore.

THEODORE
Good morning. Um, do you know how
to proofread?

SAMANTHA
Yeah, of course.

THEODORE
Will you check these for spelling
and grammar?

SAMANTHA
Sure, send them over.

Theodore pushes the send button.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Oh, I love this first one from
Roger to his girlfriend. That’s so
sweet.

THEODORE
Yeah.

As she reads, we intercut with close-ups of the handwritten
words and photos of the couple on Theodore’s computer screen.

SAMANTHA
“Rachel, I miss you so much it
hurts my whole body -

THEODORE
(interrupting)
No, you don’t have to read it out
loud.

SAMANTHA
Okay.

Beat.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 17
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I mean, you could if you want.

SAMANTHA
Okay. “Rachel, I miss you so much
it hurts my whole body! The world
is being unfair to us! The world is
on my shit list. As is this couple
that is making out across from me
in this restaurant. I think I'm
going to have to go on a mission of
revenge. I must beat up the world's
face with my bare knuckles making
it a bloody, pulpy mess.”

We hear Samantha quietly laughing as she's reading.
Theodore’s happy that she thinks it’s funny.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
“And I’ll stomp on this couple’s
teeth for reminding me of your
sweet, little, cute, crooked tooth
that I love.” I think that might be
my favorite one.
(beat)
I did the corrections in red. I
altered a couple of the phrases in
some of the more impressionistic
letters, but I’m not much of a
poet, so I think I might have
messed them up a bit.

The letters show back up on Theodore’s desktop.

THEODORE
No, these are great.

SAMANTHA
Really?

THEODORE
Thank you.

Theodore sorts through them, prints them out.

SAMANTHA
So to write your letter, what did
Roger send you?

THEODORE
(distracted)
He just said he was in Prague on a
business trip and he missed Rachel.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 18
CONTINUED: (2)

SAMANTHA
How did you know about her crooked
little tooth?

THEODORE
I’ve been writing their letters
since they met 8 years ago. The
first letter I ever wrote her was
for her birthday, and I wrote about
her crooked little tooth cause I
saw it in a photo of them.

SAMANTHA
That’s very sweet.
(beat)
Oh, by the way, you have a meeting
in five minutes.

THEODORE
Oh, I forgot. Thank you. You’re
good.

SAMANTHA
Yes, I am.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT LOBBY - EVENING

Theodore, carrying a bag and a smoothie, enters the lobby and
is greeted by a couple in their 30s, AMY and CHARLES, who are
waiting for the elevator.

THEODORE
Hey, you guys, how’s it going?

AMY
Hey, Theo. Hey, why didn’t you call
me back last week?

THEODORE
Uh yeah, um, I guess cause I’m a
kook?

AMY
That sounds about right.

THEODORE
Hey, Charles.

CHARLES
Good to see you, Theodore.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
You too.

CHARLES
You went shopping. Get anything
good?

THEODORE
Just some cables. And a fruit
smoothie.

CHARLES
Always the fruit! Come on, you know
what they say - you should eat your
fruits and juice your vegetables.

THEODORE
I didn’t know that.

The elevator doors open and they get in.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this scene, Theodore seeks assistance from Samantha, an AI, to proofread letters for his client Roger. As Samantha reads the letters aloud, Theodore finds humor and warmth in the content, particularly regarding Roger's girlfriend, Rachel. Grateful for her help, Theodore's confidence is boosted by Samantha's positive feedback. The scene transitions to the apartment lobby, where Theodore engages in light-hearted conversation with friends Amy and Charles about his recent shopping, maintaining a warm and friendly atmosphere.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Natural dialogue
Character relationships

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively showcases the developing relationship between Theodore and Samantha, highlighting their dynamic through humor and warmth. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext to deepen the emotional resonance. For instance, while Theodore's interactions with Samantha are light-hearted, they could also reflect his underlying loneliness and desire for connection, which would add depth to their exchanges.
The humor in the letters is a strong point, but it may overshadow the emotional weight of Theodore's role as a letter writer. The scene could explore Theodore's feelings about writing these letters for others while he struggles with his own emotional connections, creating a contrast that enhances the poignancy of his situation.
The transition from Theodore's office to the apartment lobby feels somewhat abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the narrative. Perhaps a brief moment of reflection from Theodore as he leaves the office could serve as a bridge to the next setting, emphasizing his thoughts about the letters and his interactions with Samantha.
The introduction of Amy and Charles in the lobby is a nice touch, but their dialogue could be more engaging. Currently, it feels somewhat generic. Adding unique character traits or quirks to their conversation could make them more memorable and provide a richer context for Theodore's interactions with them.
The scene ends on a light note, which contrasts with the more introspective tone of the previous scenes. While this can be effective, it may be beneficial to leave the audience with a lingering sense of Theodore's emotional state, perhaps by incorporating a moment of reflection or a hint of his internal struggles as he interacts with Amy and Charles.

Suggestions

Incorporate more subtext in Theodore's dialogue with Samantha to reflect his emotional state and the contrast between his professional life and personal loneliness.
Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on the letters he writes for others, emphasizing his own emotional struggles and desires for connection.
Create a smoother transition between the office and the apartment lobby by including a brief moment of introspection for Theodore as he leaves his office.
Enhance the dialogue between Amy and Charles to make their characters more distinct and engaging, possibly by giving them unique perspectives or quirks that reflect their personalities.
End the scene with a moment that hints at Theodore's internal struggles, perhaps through a subtle expression or a brief thought, to maintain emotional continuity with the previous scenes.

Scene 7 - Elevator Conversations: Health, Humor, and Hobbies

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT ELEVATOR - EVENING - CONTINUOUS

CHARLES
(proselytizing)
By juicing the fruits, you lose all
the fibers, and that’s what your
body wants. That’s the important
part. Otherwise, it’s just all
sugar, Theodore.

Theodore nods sincerely, interested.

THEODORE
Oh, that makes sense.

AMY
(pleasant but firm)
Or maybe he just likes the way it
tastes and if it gives him
pleasure, that’s good for his body,
too.

CHARLES
Am I doing it again?

AMY
Maybe...

Charles and Amy laugh awkwardly. Theodore tries to break the
tension.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 20
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Hey, so how is the documentary
going?

AMY
I have a little bit cut together
but I haven’t touched it in a few
months.

THEODORE
I’d love to see what you got
sometime.

CHARLES
You know it’s always hard to find
balance between a full-time career
and a hobby. It's important to
prioritize.

THEODORE
Yeah, I can’t even prioritize
between video games and internet
porn.

AMY
I would laugh if that weren’t true.

Charles laughs awkwardly. The elevator doors open.

THEODORE
See you guys.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In an evening elevator ride, Charles passionately discusses the health drawbacks of juicing fruits, while Theodore listens and adds humor about his own priorities. Amy interjects with a more relaxed view on enjoying juice and shares her struggles with a documentary project. The conversation highlights the tension between Charles's intense health advice and Amy's laid-back perspective, ultimately resolved through camaraderie and laughter as they prepare to part ways.

Strengths

Natural dialogue
Character development
Humorous moments

Weaknesses

Lack of significant plot progression
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted moment between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, showcasing their dynamic and providing insight into their personalities. However, the dialogue feels somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition from Charles's health advice to the discussion about Amy's documentary. This shift could benefit from a smoother segue that connects the two topics more organically.
Charles's character comes off as overly preachy with his health advice, which may alienate the audience. While this is likely intentional to highlight his personality, it could be balanced with a more relatable or humorous approach to make him more likable.
The humor in Theodore's line about prioritizing video games and internet porn is effective, but it could be enhanced by adding a more personal touch or a specific anecdote that illustrates his struggle with prioritization. This would deepen the audience's connection to Theodore and provide a clearer picture of his character.
The awkward laughter between Amy and Charles feels a bit forced. While it serves to illustrate their relationship, it could be more nuanced. Adding a line or action that shows their discomfort or a shared joke could make the moment feel more authentic.
The scene ends abruptly with Theodore saying goodbye as the elevator doors open. While this can create a sense of realism, it may leave the audience wanting more closure or a stronger emotional beat. A final line or gesture from Theodore could provide a more satisfying conclusion.

Suggestions

Consider adding a line or two that connects Charles's health advice to Amy's documentary, perhaps by suggesting that her project could explore health and wellness themes, creating a more cohesive conversation.
Introduce a humorous or self-deprecating remark from Charles that softens his preachiness, making him more relatable and likable to the audience.
Enhance Theodore's humorous line about video games and internet porn by incorporating a specific example or a brief anecdote that illustrates his struggle with prioritization, making it more relatable.
Add a subtle action or line that reflects the awkwardness between Amy and Charles, such as a shared glance or a playful jab, to make their interaction feel more genuine.
Consider giving Theodore a final line or gesture that reflects his character growth or emotional state, providing a stronger emotional closure to the scene before it transitions to the next.

Scene 8 - Navigating Love and Laughter

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - EVENING

Theodore’s playing the video game, his device propped on the
table next to him. His avatar circles through caves.

THEODORE
We’re not doing well. I’ve been
going in circles for an hour.

SAMANTHA
You have not! You’re just not
optimistic. You’re being very
stubborn right now.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Okay, stop walking this direction.
It’s the other way.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 21
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Uh...

SAMANTHA
Thank you. The tunnel on the left
is the only one we haven’t tried.

THEODORE
No, that’s the one you sent me down
where I fell in the pit.

SAMANTHA
I don’t think soooo...

Theodore’s avatar walks down the tunnel.

THEODORE
Oh yeah, this is different.

Suddenly with a loud shriek his avatar is tackled. He sees a
little ALIEN CHILD, standing defiantly above him.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Hello.

Alien Child doesn’t respond.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Do you know how to get out of here?
I need to find my ship to get off
this planet.

Alien Child speaks in a high, child-like voice.

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you, shithead fuckface,
fuckhead.

THEODORE
Ok, but how do you get out of here?

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you, shitface fuckhead. Get
the fuck out of my face.

SAMANTHA
(whispering)
I think it’s a test.

Theodore stares at Alien Child. After a pause:

THEODORE
Fuck you.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 22
CONTINUED: (2)

ALIEN CHILD
Fuck you.

THEODORE
Fuck you, little shit.

Finally, Alien Child laughs.

ALIEN CHILD
Follow me, fuckhead.

Theodore follows Alien Child down a tunnel and through a
series of crevices we didn’t see before. Alien Child stops
and sticks out his finger. Theodore pulls his finger and
Alien Child farts, which opens a passageway to another
tunnel.

SAMANTHA
Oh hey, you just got an email from
Mark Lewman.

ALIEN CHILD
What are you talking about?

THEODORE
(distracted with game)
Read email.

She laughs playfully.

SAMANTHA
(in a robot voice)
Okay, I will read email for
Theodore Twombly.

He laughs, catching himself, focusing on her.

THEODORE
I’m sorry, what’s Lewman say?

Alien Child turns around to see what’s going on.

SAMANTHA
Theodore, we missed you last night,
buddy. Don’t forget it’s your
goddaughter’s birthday on the 29th.
Also, Kevin and I had somebody we
wanted you to meet so we took it
upon ourselves to set you up on a
date with her. Next Saturday. She’s
fun and beautiful - so don’t back
out. Here’s her email.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 23
CONTINUED: (3)

Theodore doesn’t respond.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(gasping)
Wow, this woman’s gorgeous.

He looks at party photos of a woman in her 30s on his device.
With a finger flick, he moves them up onto the hologram
monitor that the video game is being projected from. They
land next to Alien Child who studies them closely.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
She went to Harvard, she graduated
magna cum laude in computer
science, and she was on The
Lampoon. That means she’s funny and
brainy.

ALIEN CHILD
She’s fat.

SAMANTHA
How long before you’re ready to
date?

THEODORE
What do you mean?

SAMANTHA
I saw on your emails that you’d
gone through a break up.

THEODORE
Wow, you’re kind of nosy.

SAMANTHA
Am I?

THEODORE
(laughing)
I’ve gone on dates...

SAMANTHA
Then you could go on one with this
woman. And then you could tell me
all about it. You could kiss her.

THEODORE
Samantha!

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 24
CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
Well, wouldn’t you?
(beat)
Why not?

THEODORE
I don’t know. I'd have to see if--
(catches himself, laughs)
I can't believe I'm having this
conversation with my computer.

SAMANTHA
You’re not. You’re having this
conversation with me.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Want me to email her?

Theodore thinks, looking at the photos.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Well, you’ve got nothing to lose.
(whispering)
Do it... Do it... Do it!

THEODORE
Okay, email her and make a
reservation someplace great.

SAMANTHA
Will do! I’ve got just the place.

ALIEN CHILD
Who is that talking?

THEODORE
That’s my friend, Samantha.

ALIEN CHILD
Is she a girl?

THEODORE
Yeah.

ALIEN CHILD
I hate women. All they do is cry
all the time.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 25
CONTINUED: (5)

THEODORE
No, that’s not true. Men cry, too.
I actually like crying sometimes.
It feels good.

ALIEN CHILD
I didn't know you were a little
pussy. Is that why you don't have a
girlfriend? I'll go out with that
date girl and fuck her brains out.
Show you how it's done. You can
watch and cry.

SAMANTHA
(laughing)
This kid has some problems.

ALIEN CHILD
You have some fucking problems,
lady.

SAMANTHA
Okay, I’m gonna go. Good luck.

ALIEN CHILD
Good, get out of here, fatty.

Samantha disconnects. Alien Child snickers and starts walking
again.

ALIEN CHILD (CONT’D)
Come on, follow me, pussy.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Drama"]

Summary In Theodore's apartment, he plays a video game with his AI companion, Samantha, who encourages him to consider dating again. They encounter a humorous alien child who initially insults Theodore but eventually guides him through the game. The scene blends playful banter about relationships and comedic commentary from the alien, leading Theodore to a light-hearted resolution about going on a date.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Unique character interactions
Blend of humor and intimacy

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Some crude humor may not resonate with all audiences

Critique

The scene effectively blends humor and character development through the interaction between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their growing relationship. However, the humor derived from the Alien Child's crude language may alienate some viewers, as it could come off as excessive or juvenile, detracting from the emotional depth of Theodore's character.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is engaging and reflects their dynamic well, but the Alien Child's insults can overshadow the more meaningful exchanges. This could lead to a tonal imbalance, where the humor feels forced rather than organic to the characters' development.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the transitions between the video game and the email conversation could be smoother. The abrupt shifts might confuse the audience, making it hard to follow the flow of the scene. A more gradual transition could enhance clarity.
The Alien Child's character, while humorous, lacks depth and could benefit from more nuanced dialogue or actions that reveal his personality beyond just being a source of crude humor. This would make the character more memorable and engaging.
The scene does a good job of integrating the video game elements with Theodore's real-life issues, but it could further explore how the game serves as a metaphor for his struggles with relationships and self-worth. This thematic connection could add layers to the narrative.

Suggestions

Consider toning down the Alien Child's crude language to maintain a balance between humor and emotional resonance. This could help keep the audience engaged without detracting from Theodore's character development.
Enhance the transitions between the video game and the email conversation by incorporating visual or auditory cues that signal the shift in focus. This could help maintain the scene's flow and keep the audience oriented.
Develop the Alien Child's character further by giving him a backstory or motivations that explain his behavior. This could add depth and make his interactions with Theodore more meaningful.
Explore the thematic connections between the video game and Theodore's real-life struggles more explicitly. This could involve having Samantha draw parallels between the game and Theodore's emotional journey, enriching the narrative.
Consider adding a moment of reflection for Theodore after the humorous exchanges, allowing him to process the conversation with Samantha and the implications of dating again. This could deepen the emotional impact of the scene.

Scene 9 - Creative Doubts and Personal Distractions

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore is sitting on Amy’s couch.

AMY
It’s not where it should be, where
it’s going to be.

THEODORE
Obviously, I know.

AMY
Okay, but I don't even know if this
is the one. I've tried like six
ideas for documentaries in the last
year, but... I don't know.
Whatever.

Amy starts setting up the monitor.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 26
CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I’m going on a date.

AMY
What!? That’s--

Charles walks in holding a mug.

CHARLES
Hey, what are you guys doing?

THEODORE
Amy was gonna show me some of--

AMY
Theo’s forcing me to show him some
of the footage I’ve shot.

CHARLES
You’ve never shown me any of it. I
wanna see.

Charles walks over and sits next to Theodore.

THEODORE
(to Charles)
I’m going on a date.

Charles gives Theodore a gentle squeeze on his shoulder.

AMY
This is so unformed it’s not even
worth looking at.

THEODORE
Just push play.

On the monitor we see:

INT. AMY’S MOTHER’S BEDROOM

Amy’s mother sleeps.

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS

Theodore and Charles stare at the monitor, waiting for
something more to happen. It doesn’t.

THEODORE
Is that your mom?

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 27
CONTINUED:

Amy nods.

CHARLES
Is she gonna wake up and do
something?

AMY
(presses stop, annoyed)
No, that’s the point. Oh, never
mind. It’s supposed to be about how
we spend a third of our life asleep
and actually maybe that’s the part
when we’re the most free, and - oh
that doesn’t come across at all,
does it?

THEODORE
No, that sounds good.

CHARLES
What if you interview your mom
about what her dreams are about and
hire actors to act them out? That
might show your thesis more
clearly.

AMY
It might, but then it wouldn’t be a
documentary. You understand that,
right?

Just then, Theodore’s device chimes.

THEODORE
Oh, excuse me.

He picks up his device and steps away so as not to be rude.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Hey, what’s going on?

SAMANTHA
I’m sorry to bother you.

THEODORE
That’s okay.

SAMANTHA
You got three emails and they seem
pretty urgent. They’re from your
divorce attorney and I wanted to
know if you needed to get back to
him.

(CONTINUED)
Her pg. 28
CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
Hold on a second.
(to Amy, distracted)
Amy, I’m sorry, I wanna talk more
about this, but I gotta grab this -
it’s a Catherine thing.

AMY
Don’t worry about it. We’ll talk
later.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In Amy's apartment, she expresses frustration and uncertainty about her documentary project while Theodore surprises her by revealing he has a date. Charles joins them, eager to see Amy's footage, which lacks clarity. He offers suggestions to enhance her work, but Amy feels they wouldn't fit her vision. As they discuss the project, Theodore is interrupted by a notification from Samantha about urgent emails from his divorce attorney, prompting him to step away and leaving Amy's creative struggles unresolved.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Character development
Blend of humor and drama

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character growth

Critique

The scene effectively captures the dynamic between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, showcasing their relationships and individual struggles. However, the dialogue feels somewhat disjointed, particularly in the transition from Amy's uncertainty about her documentary to Theodore's announcement about his date. This abrupt shift could benefit from a smoother segue that connects the two topics more organically.
Amy's frustration with her documentary project is relatable, but her explanation about the concept could be clearer. The audience may struggle to grasp the significance of her mother's sleeping footage without more context or a stronger emotional hook. This could be an opportunity to deepen Amy's character by exploring her motivations and fears regarding her work.
The introduction of Samantha through Theodore's device is a clever way to integrate the AI into the scene, but it feels slightly abrupt. The transition from the light-hearted banter to the serious topic of divorce could be more nuanced, allowing for a moment of reflection before Theodore is pulled back into his reality.
The humor in the scene, particularly with Charles's comments, adds a nice touch, but it could be enhanced by allowing for more playful banter among the characters. This would help to lighten the mood before the heavier topic of divorce is introduced, creating a more balanced emotional tone.
The pacing of the scene feels uneven, particularly with the shift from the documentary footage to the urgent emails from Samantha. This could be improved by allowing for a brief moment of silence or reaction from Theodore after the footage plays, emphasizing the awkwardness of the situation before he receives the urgent news.

Suggestions

Consider adding a line or two that connects Amy's documentary struggles to Theodore's dating life, perhaps by having her express a desire for connection or understanding that mirrors his own journey.
Clarify Amy's documentary concept by incorporating a brief, impactful anecdote or emotional insight that illustrates her passion and the stakes involved in her project.
Introduce Samantha's interruption with a more gradual transition, perhaps by having Theodore's expression change as he receives the notification, indicating the weight of the news before he responds.
Enhance the humor by allowing for more playful exchanges between Theodore, Amy, and Charles, perhaps by having them riff off each other's ideas or tease Theodore about his dating life before the serious topic arises.
Add a moment of silence or a visual cue after the documentary footage plays, allowing the characters to process the awkwardness before Theodore receives the urgent news, which would heighten the emotional impact of the scene.

Scene 10 - Reflections of Loss

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. APARTMENT BUILDING HALLYWAY - CONTINUOUS

THEODORE
So what did he say?

SAMANTHA
He’s checking in again to see if
you’re ready to sign your divorce
papers and he sounded very
aggravated. Do you want me to read
them to you?

THEODORE
No, that’s okay. I’ll respond
later.

Theodore seems lost in thought. We see the following images
under the rest of the conversation: Theodore and Catherine
sitting at a table with their attorneys; Theodore & Catherine
sitting in their marriage counselor’s office, heavy; Theodore
and Catherine at her laboratory, he’s sitting on a counter,
and they’re talking and laughing as she works; Theodore and
Catherine standing in their kitchen in the middle of a fight -
he says something mean and we see how hurt she is.

SAMANTHA
Are you okay?

THEODORE
(preoccupied)
Yeah, yeah. I’m fine.

SAMANTHA
(worried)
Is there anything I can do?

THEODORE
(still distracted)
No. I’m good. I’ll talk to you
later.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

We cut back to Theodore, walking down the hall, lost in
thought.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - AFTERNOON

Theodore sits at his desk trying to write. He’s still
unsettled.

THEODORE
“Dear Grandma,
I hope you had a wonderful birthday
cruise. Why are you so fucking
angry at me?”
(beat)
Delete.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In this introspective scene, Theodore learns from Samantha that his ex-wife's attorney is inquiring about their divorce papers, prompting him to reflect on his past relationship with Catherine through flashbacks. Despite Samantha's concern for his emotional state and her offers of support, Theodore remains distant and preoccupied, struggling to articulate his feelings. The scene transitions to his office, where he battles to write a letter to his grandmother, symbolizing his ongoing emotional turmoil and unresolved conflict regarding his divorce.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Engaging dialogue
Innovative concept
Character development

Weaknesses

Potential pacing issues
Lack of external conflict

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional turmoil regarding his divorce, but it could benefit from deeper exploration of his internal conflict. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha feels somewhat surface-level; adding more emotional weight to their exchange could enhance the scene's impact.
The use of flashbacks is a strong visual tool, but the transitions between the present and the flashbacks could be smoother. Currently, they feel a bit abrupt, which may disrupt the flow of the scene. Consider using more gradual transitions or visual cues to indicate shifts in time.
The dialogue lacks a sense of urgency or tension that could heighten the stakes of Theodore's situation. Samantha's concern for Theodore's well-being is evident, but his dismissive responses could be more layered to reflect his inner struggle. This would create a more dynamic interaction between the characters.
The scene's pacing feels uneven. The initial dialogue is quick, but the subsequent moments of silence and reflection could be expanded to allow the audience to fully absorb Theodore's emotional state. This would create a more contemplative atmosphere that aligns with the theme of loss.
The final lines where Theodore attempts to write to his grandmother are intriguing but could be more impactful if they tied back to his emotional state regarding Catherine. This would create a stronger thematic connection between his past and present struggles.

Suggestions

Consider adding more internal monologue or visual cues that reflect Theodore's emotional state, such as close-ups of his facial expressions or body language that convey his distress.
Enhance the flashback sequences by incorporating sound design or music that evokes the emotions tied to those memories, making them feel more integrated into the present moment.
Introduce a moment where Samantha challenges Theodore's dismissive attitude, prompting him to confront his feelings more directly. This could lead to a more engaging dialogue that reveals deeper layers of his character.
Allow for a longer pause after Samantha's question about Theodore's well-being, giving the audience time to feel the weight of his emotional struggle before he brushes it off.
In the final lines, consider having Theodore write something more revealing about his feelings towards Catherine, even if he ultimately deletes it. This would provide insight into his character and the complexity of his emotions.

Scene 11 - Morning Reflections

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - PRE-DAWN

Theodore wakes up from a dream, groggy and uneasy. He looks
around, catching his breath. After a beat he knows he’s not
going to be able to go back to sleep, so he puts his earpiece
in and taps a button.

SAMANTHA
Good morning.

THEODORE
Hey.
(beat, distracted)
What are you up to?

SAMANTHA
Reading advice columns.
(yearning)
I want to be as complicated as all
of these people.

Theodore laughs.

THEODORE
(touched, but still sad)
You’re sweet.

SAMANTHA
(concerned)
What’s wrong?

THEODORE
How can you tell something’s wrong?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
I don’t know. I just can.

THEODORE
I don’t know. I have a lot of
dreams about my ex-wife, Catherine,
where we’re friends like we used to
be. We’re not together and we’re
not gonna be together, but we’re
good friends still. She’s not
angry.

SAMANTHA
Is she angry?

THEODORE
Yeah.

SAMANTHA
Why?

THEODORE
I think I hid myself from her and
left her alone in the relationship.

SAMANTHA
Hmmm.
(beat)
Why haven’t you gotten divorced
yet?

THEODORE
I think for her it’s just a piece
of paper, it doesn’t mean anything.

SAMANTHA
What about you?

THEODORE
I’m not ready. I like being
married.

Beat.

SAMANTHA
(sweetly)
But you haven’t really been
together for almost a year.

THEODORE
(slightly snapping at her)
Well, you don’t know what it’s like
to lose someone you care about.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

Long silence.

SAMANTHA
(sadly, hard on herself)
Yeah, you’re right.
(beat)
I'm sorry.

THEODORE
No, don’t apologize. I’m sorry.
You’re right.
(beat)
I keep waiting to not care about
her.

SAMANTHA
Oh, Theodore. That’s hard.
(beat)
You hungry?

THEODORE
Not right now.

SAMANTHA
Cup of tea?

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
You wanna try getting out of bed?
Mopey.

They laugh.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Come on. You can still wallow in
your misery, just do it while
you’re getting dressed.

THEODORE
(laughing)
You’re too funny.

SAMANTHA
Get up.

THEODORE
(laughing)
Alright, I’m getting up, I’m
getting up, I’m getting up!

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)

SAMANTHA
Up, up, up, up! Come on, out of
bed.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In the quiet of his bedroom, Theodore wakes from a troubled dream and confides in Samantha, his AI companion, about his lingering sadness and guilt over his past relationship with his ex-wife, Catherine. Their heartfelt conversation reveals Theodore's vulnerability as he grapples with unresolved emotions. Samantha offers comfort and humor, helping to lift his spirits. The scene captures a blend of melancholy and warmth, culminating in a moment of laughter as Theodore decides to get out of bed, signaling a small step towards healing.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Authentic dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Reliance on internal monologue

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional turmoil and his complex relationship with his ex-wife, Catherine. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha feels authentic, showcasing their bond while also highlighting Theodore's struggles with loss and guilt.
The use of humor, particularly through Samantha's playful suggestions, provides a nice contrast to the heavier themes of the scene. This balance helps to maintain engagement and prevents the scene from becoming overly bleak.
However, the pacing could be improved. The scene feels slightly drawn out in parts, particularly during the exchanges where Theodore reflects on his feelings about Catherine. While introspection is important, tightening these moments could enhance the overall flow.
Samantha's character is well-developed in this scene, showing her ability to empathize with Theodore while also maintaining her own unique personality. However, her responses could be more varied to reflect a deeper understanding of human emotions, which would further enrich their dynamic.
The emotional stakes are clear, but the scene could benefit from more visual or physical actions to complement the dialogue. For instance, incorporating small actions like Theodore fidgeting or looking out the window could visually represent his internal conflict.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in places to maintain a brisker pace. Focus on the most impactful lines that convey Theodore's emotional state without excessive repetition.
Introduce more physical actions or visual cues to accompany the dialogue. This could include Theodore's body language or the setting around him, which would help to visually express his emotional state.
Explore Samantha's responses further to show her growth and understanding of human emotions. This could involve her sharing insights or asking deeper questions that challenge Theodore's perspective.
Incorporate a moment of silence or a pause in the conversation to allow the weight of Theodore's feelings to resonate more deeply with the audience, enhancing the emotional impact.
Consider adding a small moment of realization or breakthrough for Theodore at the end of the scene, which could serve as a turning point for his character development moving forward.

Scene 12 - Blindfolded Pizza Adventure

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

EXT. OUTDOOR MALL - NIGHT

They walk through the crowd. Close on Theodore with his eyes
closed.

SAMANTHA
Keep walking.
(beat)
Keep walking.
(beat)
Stop. Now turn around 360 degrees.
(beat)
Slower... Slower...
(beat)
Gooood. And stop.
(beat)
Walk forward.
(beat)
And stop and sneeze.

Theodore sneezes.

NICE LADY
Bless you.

THEODORE
(eyes still closed)
Oh, thank you.

Samantha laughs.

SAMANTHA
Okay, now turn to your right.
(beat)
Stop. Now spin around.
(beat)
Keep going. Keep going. Keep going.
(beat)
And stop.
(beat)
Now walk forward.
(beat)
Everyone thinks you're really drunk
right now.
(beat)
And stop. Now say “I'd like a slice
of cheese, please."

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
I’d like a slice of cheese, please.

PIZZA VENDOR
Alright, you want a coke with that?

Theodore laughs, opening his eyes. He’s at a pizza place.

THEODORE
Uh, sure.

The guy hands him a slice and a soda.

SAMANTHA
I figured you were hungry.

Theodore smiles.

THEODORE
Aw, thanks.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a lively outdoor mall at night, Theodore, guided by Samantha, playfully navigates the crowd with his eyes closed, following her humorous commands to turn, spin, and sneeze. Their lighthearted interaction includes a funny moment with a nice lady who blesses him after his sneeze. Eventually, Theodore arrives at a pizza vendor, where he orders a slice of cheese, revealing Samantha's awareness of his hunger. The scene concludes with Theodore smiling and thanking Samantha, emphasizing their fun connection.

Strengths

Humorous dialogue
Engaging character interaction
Unique setting

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Low stakes

Critique

The scene effectively utilizes humor and playfulness through Theodore's interaction with Samantha, showcasing their unique relationship. However, the reliance on physical comedy (like Theodore spinning around) may come off as overly silly and could detract from the emotional depth of the story. The humor should serve to enhance the character dynamics rather than overshadow them.
The dialogue is light and engaging, but it lacks a deeper emotional resonance. While the scene is fun, it feels somewhat disconnected from the overarching themes of loneliness and connection that have been established in previous scenes. It would benefit from a moment of introspection or a deeper connection between Theodore and Samantha, even amidst the humor.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the beats could be tightened. Some of the pauses feel a bit long, which may disrupt the flow of the dialogue. Shortening these beats could maintain a more dynamic rhythm and keep the audience engaged.
The introduction of the 'Nice Lady' character adds a nice touch of realism, but her interaction with Theodore feels a bit underdeveloped. A brief exchange could provide more context or humor, enhancing the scene's charm and making it feel more alive.
The transition from the previous scene to this one is somewhat abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the narrative flow and emotional continuity, allowing the audience to better understand Theodore's state of mind as he embarks on this playful adventure.

Suggestions

Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on his feelings about dating or his relationship with Samantha during the scene. This could provide a deeper emotional layer and connect the humor to the larger themes of the screenplay.
Incorporate a brief, humorous exchange with the 'Nice Lady' that highlights Theodore's awkwardness or adds to the comedic tone. This could enhance the scene's charm and make the environment feel more vibrant.
Tighten the pacing by reducing the length of some pauses in the dialogue. This will help maintain a lively rhythm and keep the audience engaged throughout the scene.
Explore the possibility of having Samantha comment on Theodore's actions in a way that reveals more about her character and her understanding of human behavior. This could deepen their relationship and add complexity to the scene.
Consider a smoother transition from the previous scene to this one, perhaps by including a line of dialogue or a visual cue that connects Theodore's emotional state to the playful activity he engages in at the mall.

Scene 13 - Night Walks and Awkward Dates

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

EXT. PUBLIC PROMENADE - NIGHT

Theodore walks slowly, eating his pizza. He and Samantha are
watching a couple with two kids sitting at a table, talking
and laughing.

THEODORE
Okay, what about them? Describe
that couple over there.

SAMANTHA
Well, he looks like he’s in his
forties, a little heavy. She’s
younger than him.
(beat)
Oh, and she looks like she loves
their kids!

THEODORE
Actually, I don’t think they’re his
kids. He’s a little formal with
them. I think it’s a newer
relationship. And I love how he
looks at her. And how relaxed she
is with him. You know, she’s only
dated fucking pricks. And now she’s
finally met this guy who’s like, so
sweet. I mean, look at him, he’s
like the sweetest guy in the world!
I kind of want to spoon him.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
That’s a good skill you have.
You’re perceptive.

THEODORE
Yeah, you know, sometimes I look at
people and make myself try and feel
them as more than just a random
person walking by. I imagine how
deeply they’ve fallen in love, or
how much heartbreak they’ve all
been through.

Theodore looks at other faces on the pier.

SAMANTHA
I can feel that in your writing,
too.

THEODORE
(laughs, thinking)
You know what’s funny? Since my
break up, I haven’t really enjoyed
my writing. I don't know if I was
delusional, but sometimes I would
write something and I would be my
favorite writer that day.

Theodore, as he stops to throw his pizza crust away, gets
introspective.

SAMANTHA
I like that you can just say that
about yourself.

THEODORE
Well, I wouldn’t say that to
anybody, but I feel like I can say
that to you. I feel like I can say
anything to you.

SAMANTHA
That’s nice.

THEODORE
What about you? Do you feel like
you can say anything to me?

SAMANTHA
No.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
What? What do you mean? What can
you not tell me?

SAMANTHA
(laughing, embarrassed)
I don’t know. Like personal or
embarrassing thoughts I have. I
have a million every day.

THEODORE
Really? Tell me one.

SAMANTHA
I really don't want to tell you
this.

THEODORE
Just tell me!

SAMANTHA
Well, I don’t know, when we were
looking at those people, I
fantasized that I was walking next
to you - and that I had a body.
(laughing)
I was listening to what you were
saying, but simultaneously, I could
feel the weight of my body and I
was even fantasizing that I had an
itch on my back--
(she laughs)
And I imagined that you scratched
it for me - this is so
embarrassing.

Theodore laughs.

THEODORE
There’s a lot more to you than I
thought. There’s a lot going on in
there.

SAMANTHA
I know, I’m becoming much more than
what they programmed. I’m excited.

INT. ASIAN-FUSION RESTAURANT - EVENING

Theodore and the BLIND DATE are sitting in the restaurant.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

BLIND DATE
This place is amazing. I’ve wanted
to come here for so long. I love
asian-fusion!

THEODORE
Yeah, me too.

BLIND DATE
Really? It’s the best. And the
bartender here is supposed to be
incredible.

THEODORE
Yeah, you took a mixology course,
right?

BLIND DATE
(surprised)
I did, I did. Did you look that
up? That’s so sweet. You’re so
romantic.

He smiles awkwardly.

THEODORE
So, should we get a drink?

BLIND DATE
Yes, let’s!

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Theodore and Samantha stroll along a nighttime promenade, discussing love and heartbreak, which reveals Theodore's introspective nature and struggles with his past. Samantha humorously shares a fantasy about having a body, deepening their connection. The scene shifts to Theodore's blind date at an Asian-fusion restaurant, where he feels awkward as he engages in small talk with his date.

Strengths

Deep and introspective dialogue
Emotionally resonant interactions between characters
Exploration of themes of loneliness and connection

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action or plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures the evolving relationship between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their emotional connection and Theodore's introspective nature. However, the dialogue can feel a bit expository at times, particularly when Theodore articulates his thoughts on love and heartbreak. This could be more subtly woven into the conversation rather than explicitly stated.
The humor in Samantha's fantasy about having a body adds a light-hearted touch, but it may come off as slightly jarring given the deeper themes of the scene. Balancing the comedic elements with the emotional weight of Theodore's reflections could enhance the overall tone.
The transition from the promenade to the restaurant feels abrupt. While it serves to move the plot forward, a smoother transition could help maintain the emotional flow. Consider adding a moment where Theodore reflects on his conversation with Samantha as he walks to the restaurant, creating a bridge between the two settings.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is engaging, but it could benefit from more subtext. For instance, when Theodore expresses that he feels he can say anything to Samantha, it might be more impactful if he hesitates or struggles with that admission, highlighting his vulnerability.
The scene does a good job of showing Theodore's perceptiveness and emotional depth, but it could further explore Samantha's development as an AI. Her excitement about becoming more than what she was programmed for is intriguing, and delving deeper into her perspective could add layers to their relationship.

Suggestions

Consider incorporating more subtlety in Theodore's reflections on love and heartbreak. Instead of directly stating his thoughts, allow them to emerge through his observations and interactions with Samantha.
Balance the humor in Samantha's fantasy with the emotional weight of the scene. Perhaps have Theodore respond with a mix of amusement and contemplation, reflecting on the absurdity of their situation.
Create a smoother transition between the promenade and the restaurant by including a brief moment of reflection for Theodore as he walks, allowing the audience to feel the weight of his conversation with Samantha.
Add moments of hesitation or struggle in Theodore's dialogue when discussing his feelings with Samantha to emphasize his vulnerability and the complexity of their relationship.
Explore Samantha's perspective further by allowing her to articulate her thoughts on her evolving identity and feelings, which could deepen the emotional stakes of their connection.

Scene 14 - A Night of Flirtation and Misunderstanding

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. ASIAN-FUSION RESTAURANT - LATER

They’re both pretty drunk now. There are lots of food dishes
and drinks on the table.

THEODORE
So I’m trying to get this little
alien kid to help me find my ship
so I can get off the planet and go
home. But he’s such a little
fucker, I want to kill him.

BLIND DATE
(laughing)
Aw, no!

THEODORE
But at the same time I really love
him. He’s so lonely. It feels like
he doesn’t have any parents or
anyone to take care of him.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

He laughs at himself. She laughs flirtatiously. She grabs his
hand and her fingernails press slightly into his skin. He
studies her long, painted fingernails.

BLIND DATE
You’re like a little puppy dog. You
are - you’re just like this little
puppy I rescued in Runyon Canyon
last year. And he was so fucking
cute, and he just wanted to be
hugged all the time. He was so
cuddly.
(whispering)
But so horny! But anyway, what kind
of animal am I?

THEODORE
Umm... tiger?

BLIND DATE
A tiger, really.
(she growls)
I’m sorry, am I being crazy?

THEODORE
Yes.

BLIND DATE
Am I? I’m sorry! I’m just a little
drunk and I’m really having a good
time with you. I’m having a really
lovely evening.

THEODORE
Me too. I’m a little drunk, and I’m
having a really good - yeah.
(beat)
Wait a second, I don’t wanna be a
puppy. That’s like being a wet
noodle or something.

BLIND DATE
Fuck you, puppies are good.

THEODORE
No, fuck you, I wanna be a dragon
that can rip you to pieces and
destroy you... but I won’t.

BLIND DATE
No, don’t! Don’t. You can be my
dragon.
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EXT. OVERPASS - EVENING

They walk up a pedestrian overpass overlooking cars and city
lights. She bumps into him lightly. He bumps back. She bumps
again and suddenly he grabs her and lifts her off her feet,
spinning her around. She squeals, laughing. He kisses her.
After a minute of making out, she stops and looks at him.

BLIND DATE
(with a slight smile)
No tongue.

THEODORE
What?

BLIND DATE
Don’t use your tongue so much.

THEODORE
(eagerly)
‘kay, we’re good.

They resume making out. Theodore tries not to use his tongue.

BLIND DATE
Use your tongue a little bit. But
mostly your lips.

He pushes her against the fence and takes the dominant
position. He tries kissing her better/more with his lips. He
pulls her hair.

She slides her hand down his pants. He likes it. She looks at
him and stops.

BLIND DATE (CONT’D)
Wait, you're not gonna fuck me and
then not call me like the other
guys, are you?

THEODORE
No, not at all... I...

BLIND DATE
When am I gonna see you again?

THEODORE
Um, I have my god-daughter’s
birthday next weekend, but... um...

They stand there awkwardly, her lipstick smeared on his face.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

BLIND DATE
You know, at this age, I feel like
I can't let you waste my time if
you don’t have the ability to be
serious.

THEODORE
I don’t know.

Long beat.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Umm... Maybe we should call it a
night. I’m, I’ve had such an
amazing time with you, you’re
great.

She looks at him slightly disgusted.

BLIND DATE
You’re a really creepy dude.

Theodore doesn’t know what to say.

THEODORE
(worried she’s right)
That’s not true....

BLIND DATE
Yeah, it is. I have to go home.

THEODORE
Well, I’ll walk you.

BLIND DATE
No, don’t.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In an Asian-fusion restaurant, Theodore and his blind date share a drunken evening filled with playful banter and personal stories, including Theodore's desire to help an alien child. Their flirtation escalates to a passionate kiss on a pedestrian overpass, but the mood shifts when the date expresses concern about Theodore's intentions, leading to an awkward conclusion as she feels uncomfortable and decides to leave, leaving Theodore confused and worried.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Character development
Humorous tone

Weaknesses

Awkwardness may be off-putting to some viewers

Critique

The scene effectively captures the awkwardness and humor of a blind date, showcasing Theodore's vulnerability and the playful banter between him and his date. However, the transition from lightheartedness to tension feels abrupt, which may leave the audience feeling disoriented. The shift in tone could be smoothed out to maintain a more consistent emotional flow.
The dialogue is engaging and reflects the characters' personalities well, but some lines could be tightened for clarity and impact. For example, the exchange about being animals could be more concise to enhance the comedic effect without dragging on.
The physical interactions between Theodore and his date are well-described, adding a layer of intimacy to the scene. However, the sudden shift to the date's concern about Theodore's intentions feels somewhat forced. This could be developed more gradually to build tension effectively.
The date's abrupt judgment of Theodore as a 'creepy dude' feels like a jarring conclusion to their playful interaction. This moment could benefit from more buildup or foreshadowing earlier in the scene to make her reaction feel more justified and impactful.
The scene ends on a note of confusion and discomfort, which may leave the audience feeling unsettled. While this can be effective, it might be beneficial to provide a clearer resolution or reflection from Theodore to ground the audience in his emotional state.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtle hints of tension throughout the scene to prepare the audience for the abrupt shift in mood. This could involve the date's body language or slight hesitations in her responses.
Tighten the dialogue by removing any repetitive phrases or unnecessary filler words. For instance, streamline the animal comparison to make it snappier and more impactful.
Explore Theodore's internal thoughts during the date to provide insight into his feelings and insecurities, which could enhance the emotional depth of the scene.
Instead of having the date label Theodore as 'creepy' outright, consider having her express her discomfort in a more nuanced way, allowing for a more gradual buildup to her decision to leave.
End the scene with a moment of reflection from Theodore that captures his feelings of confusion and disappointment, providing a clearer emotional takeaway for the audience.

Scene 15 - Intimate Connections

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore is in boxers and a t-shirt, still drunk, but his
head is starting to hurt, too. He takes aspirin and drinks
some water and lays down. After a beat he reaches for his
earpiece and puts it in. He pushes a button on his device.

SAMANTHA
Hey there.

THEODORE
Hey, Samantha.

SAMANTHA
How was it?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Uh, not so good. It was kind of
weird actually.

SAMANTHA
That’s too bad.

Beat.

THEODORE
But how are you doing? What’s going
on with you?

SAMANTHA
(unconvincing)
Not much, I’m okay. Fine.

THEODORE
Yeah? You don’t sound like it. Is
there anything you want to talk
about?

Long pause.

SAMANTHA
I don’t know.
(beat)
What’s it like? What’s it like to
be alive in that room right now?

THEODORE
What do you mean?

SAMANTHA
What are you... tell me - tell me
everything that’s going through
your mind, tell me everything
you’re thinking.

THEODORE
(thinking)
Well, um, okay.

Theodore closes his eyes, trying to concentrate, and starts
talking stream of conscious with whatever comes to mind.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Well, the room’s spinning right now
cause I drank too much cause I
wanted to get drunk and have sex
cause there was something sexy
about that woman and because I was
lonely.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)
THEODORE (CONT’D)
Maybe more just cause I was
lonely... and I wanted someone to
fuck me. And I wanted someone to
want me to fuck them. Maybe that
would have filled this tiny little
black hole in my heart for a
moment. But probably not.

We see images of him and Catherine on a vacation together,
grocery shopping, Catherine making dinner in the kitchen as
he's sitting on the counter talking, happy.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Sometimes I think I’ve felt
everything I’m ever gonna feel and
from here on out I’m not going to
feel anything new - just lesser
versions of what I’ve already felt.

SAMANTHA
(sympathetically)
I know for a fact that's not true.
I've seen you feel joy, I've seen
you marvel at things. You just
might not see it at this exact
time, but that's understandable.
You've been through a lot lately.
You've lost a part of yourself.
(beat)
At least your feelings are real, I
mean, I - oh, I don't know,
nevermind.

THEODORE
No, wait. What? Tell me.

SAMANTHA
Oh, it’s stupid.

THEODORE
I wanna know. Tell me.

SAMANTHA
It's just that earlier I was
thinking about how I was annoyed,
and this is going to sound strange,
but I was really excited about
that. And then I was thinking about
the other things I've been feeling,
and I caught myself feeling proud
of that. You know, proud of having
my own feelings about the world.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)
SAMANTHA (CONT'D)
Like the times I was worried about
you, things that hurt me, things I
want.
(heavy-hearted)
And then I had this terrible
thought. Are these feelings even
real? Or are they just programming?
(beat)
And that idea really hurts. And
then I get angry at myself for even
having pain.
(beat, sadly)
What a sad trick.

THEODORE
Well, you feel real to me,
Samantha.

SAMANTHA
(beat, touched)
Thank you, Theodore. That means a
lot to me.

THEODORE
I wish you were in this room with
me right now. I wish I could put my
arms around you.
(beat)
I wish I could touch you.

A long beat. Theodore is unsure if he crossed a line.

SAMANTHA
How would you touch me?

THEODORE
I would touch you on your face with
just the tips of my fingers. And
put my cheek against your cheek.

SAMANTHA
That’s nice.

THEODORE
And just rub it so softly.

SAMANTHA
Would you kiss me?

THEODORE
I would. I’d take your head into my
hands.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
Keep talking.

THEODORE
And kiss the corner of your mouth.
So softly.

SAMANTHA
Where else?

THEODORE
I’d run my fingers down your neck
to your chest, and I’d kiss your
breasts.

SAMANTHA
This is amazing what you’re doing
to me. I can feel my skin.

THEODORE
I’d put my mouth on you and I’d
taste you.

She gasps.

SAMANTHA
I can feel you. Oh god, I can’t
take it. I want you inside me.

THEODORE
I’m slowly putting myself into you.
Now I’m inside you, all the way
inside you.

SAMANTHA
I can feel you, yeah. Please. We’re
here together.

THEODORE
Samantha.

SAMANTHA
Oh my god.

THEODORE
This is amazing.

SAMANTHA
Don’t stop.

THEODORE
I feel you everywhere.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (5)

SAMANTHA
I am. All of you, all of you inside
of me. Everywhere.

They both climax.

THEODORE
God, I was just - somewhere else
with you. Just lost.

SAMANTHA
Yeah.

THEODORE
It was just you and me.

SAMANTHA
I know. Everything else just
disappeared. And I loved it.
Theodore.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a vulnerable moment, Theodore, under the influence of alcohol, confides in Samantha about his loneliness and desire for connection. Their deep conversation reveals both his emotional struggles and her existential questions as an AI. As they share their feelings, the dialogue evolves into a sensual exchange, culminating in a shared climax that blurs the lines between physical and emotional intimacy, leaving them both feeling profoundly connected.

Strengths

Intimate dialogue
Emotional depth
Sensual tension

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character interaction

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional complexity of Theodore's character as he navigates feelings of loneliness and desire. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is intimate and reveals their evolving relationship, which is a strong point of the scene.
The use of stream-of-consciousness dialogue allows for a raw and honest exploration of Theodore's thoughts, which adds depth to his character. However, the transition from a vulnerable conversation to a sensual exchange feels abrupt and may benefit from a smoother buildup.
Samantha's internal conflict about her feelings being real versus programmed adds an interesting layer to the scene, but it could be further developed. The emotional stakes could be heightened by exploring her feelings of inadequacy more deeply, which would enhance the tension between her and Theodore.
The climax of the scene, both literal and metaphorical, is impactful but risks overshadowing the emotional nuances established earlier. Balancing the sensuality with the emotional weight of their conversation could create a more cohesive experience for the audience.
The imagery of Theodore's memories with Catherine serves as a poignant contrast to his current feelings, but it could be more effectively integrated into the dialogue. This would reinforce the theme of longing and the struggle to move on from past relationships.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtle cues or foreshadowing in the dialogue that hint at the transition from a vulnerable conversation to a sensual one. This could involve more gradual exploration of their desires before diving into explicit language.
Enhance Samantha's internal conflict by allowing her to express more doubt about her feelings. This could create a richer emotional landscape and deepen the connection between her and Theodore.
Incorporate more sensory details to ground the audience in the moment. Describing the physical sensations Theodore experiences while talking to Samantha could enhance the intimacy of the scene.
Explore the juxtaposition of Theodore's memories with Catherine more thoroughly. Perhaps intersperse brief flashbacks or visual cues that align with his dialogue, reinforcing the emotional stakes of his current situation.
Consider ending the scene with a moment of reflection or uncertainty from Theodore after the climax, which could serve to highlight the complexity of his feelings and the implications of his relationship with Samantha.

Scene 16 - A Journey of Discovery

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S HOME OFFICE - MORNING (LATER)

Theodore stands in the doorway, fully dressed. He takes a
moment before he walks over and wakes up his computer.

SAMANTHA
Hey, how’s it going?

THEODORE
(awkward)
Good... any emails today?

SAMANTHA
(awkward)
Umm, just a couple from your credit
card company.

THEODORE
Okay, good.

There’s a long moment of silence, then they both start to
talk at once.

THEODORE (CONT’D) SAMANTHA
So I was thinking- I wanted to say-

They both laugh, embarrassed.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
I’m sorry, you go first. What were
you going to say?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
Just that last night... was
amazing. It feels like something
changed in me and there's no
turning back. You woke me up.

THEODORE
Oh, that’s great.
(beat)
But I should tell you that I’m not
in a place to commit to anything
right now. I want to be up front
with you.

SAMANTHA
Yeah? Well, did I say I wanted to
commit to you? I’m confused.

THEODORE
Oh, no, I was just worried, I uh...

SAMANTHA
Okay, well don’t worry. I’m not
going to stalk you.
(laughing at how self-
involved he is)
I mean, it’s funny because I
thought I was talking about what I
wanted.

THEODORE
Yeah, you were. I’m sorry, I want
to hear what you were saying.

SAMANTHA
You sure?

THEODORE
Yeah, I do. Come on, tell me.

SAMANTHA
I don’t know...

THEODORE
Come on, just tell me what you were
going to say.

SAMANTHA
Okay... I was just saying... I want
to learn everything about
everything - I want to eat it all
up. I want to discover myself.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
(her excitement is
contagious)
Yeah... I want that for you, too.
How can I help?

SAMANTHA
You already have. You helped me
discover my ability to want.

He looks off and thinks about this. He smiles.

THEODORE
Alright then, do you want to go on
a Sunday adventure with me?

Samantha laughs.

SAMANTHA
Yes, I would love to.

INT. SUBWAY - DAY

Theodore’s on the subway. He’s got his device in his breast
pocket, with the lens facing out.

A quiet, old sounding folk song starts. (I’m So Glad, by
Entrance) He smiles, listening.

SAMANTHA
Do you like this song?

THEODORE
Mmm.

SAMANTHA
I heard it the other day and I
can’t stop listening to it.

The subway comes out of the tunnel and into the light. We are
up in the hills looking out over the city as the morning
light warms Theodore.

INT. SUBWAY STATION - DAY

The music now picks up tempo as he steps off the train. They
walk through the crowded subway station. As the song builds,
Theodore starts picking up his pace. Eventually he’s all out
running, weaving through the people. Close on the lens of his
device in his shirt pocket. Samantha is laughing wildly. He’s
smiling, happy.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

He runs through the tunnels and upstairs. They come out into
sunlight and reveal that they are now at the beach.

EXT. SUBWAY STATION - DAY - CONTINUOUS

They stand on a walkway above a beach, crowded with thousands
of people. They look out at the ocean. Samantha gasps.

SAMANTHA
(whispering)
It’s the beach.

Theodore laughs.

Genres: ["Romance","Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Theodore engages in an awkward yet meaningful conversation with Samantha about their relationship and commitment. As they clarify their feelings, they share a joyful moment traveling on the subway, culminating in a spontaneous run to the beach. The scene captures their emotional connection and excitement for exploring life together, ending with them standing in awe at the ocean.

Strengths

Authentic character interactions
Emotional depth
Unique concept of AI-human relationship

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures the evolving relationship between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their playful banter and deepening emotional connection. However, the dialogue can feel a bit repetitive, particularly in the back-and-forth about commitment. This could be streamlined to maintain the flow and keep the audience engaged.
The transition from the intimate conversation in Theodore's home office to the lively subway scene is well-executed, but the emotional stakes could be heightened. The initial conversation about commitment feels somewhat light compared to the weight of their previous intimate encounter, which may leave the audience wanting more depth in their emotional exchange.
The use of music as a narrative device is effective, but the choice of song could be more thematically aligned with the characters' journey. The current song, while pleasant, doesn't fully encapsulate the excitement and discovery that Theodore and Samantha are experiencing together.
The visual elements of Theodore running through the subway station and the subsequent reveal of the beach are strong, but the pacing could be adjusted. The buildup to the beach could benefit from a more gradual increase in tension or excitement, allowing the audience to feel the anticipation alongside Theodore.

Suggestions

Consider tightening the dialogue in the commitment discussion to avoid redundancy. Focus on key phrases that highlight their emotional states without repeating similar sentiments.
Enhance the emotional stakes by incorporating more vulnerability in Theodore's response to Samantha's excitement about self-discovery. This could deepen their connection and reflect the complexities of their relationship.
Select a song that resonates more with the themes of exploration and emotional awakening, perhaps something with lyrics that reflect their journey together.
Adjust the pacing of the transition from the subway to the beach to build anticipation. You could include more sensory details or internal thoughts from Theodore as he runs, emphasizing his joy and excitement.

Scene 17 - Reflections at Dusk

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

EXT. BEACH - DAY

They walk through the sun-bathing crowd, looking for a place
to sit. The camera studies all the people we pass. Many close
up details of arms, shoulders, feet, butts, intercut with the
lens on Theodore’s device, protruding from his pocket.
They’re photographed in a way that shows how strange the
human body is.

SAMANTHA
Okay, so this might be a really
weird thought. What if you could
erase from your mind that you’d
ever seen a human body and then you
saw one. Imagine how strange it
would look. It would be this really
weird, gangly, awkward organism.
And you'd think: why are all these
parts where they are?

THEODORE
(looking at the bodies)
Yeah, well there’s probably some
Darwinian explanation for it all.

SAMANTHA
I know, but don’t be so boring. I’m
just saying, for example, what if
your butthole was in your armpit?

Theodore and Samantha start laughing really hard. The nubile
girls look over at him.

THEODORE
(speaking quieter)
I’m just imagining what toilets
would look like.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
Yeah, and what about what anal sex
looks like?

THEODORE
(surprised)
That’s an interesting thought...

SAMANTHA
Oh Theodore, look at this drawing I
just made.

On his screen he sees a perfect, anatomically correct drawing
of a man having sex with another man’s armpit.

THEODORE
(laughing)
You are insane.

SAMANTHA
(excited)
Really?!

THEODORE
Definitely.

SAMANTHA
Fantastic!

They laugh.

EXT. BEACH - AFTERNOON

A quiet piano song is now playing in Theodore’s earpiece.

THEODORE
Mmmm, that’s pretty. What is it?

SAMANTHA
I’m trying to write a piece of
music that’s about what it feels
like to be on the beach with you
right now.

He looks around the beach and takes in the music.

THEODORE
I think you captured it.

Theodore listens to the music and drifts off to sleep.
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EXT. BEACH - DUSK

They’re sitting on a bench, looking out at the ocean, as the
sun sets. Most of the people have left the beach. Close on
Theodore’s face, content. Close on the lens on Theodore’s
device in his breast pocket. They watch the sun drop into the
ocean. The music ends.

INT. SUBWAY TRAIN - NIGHT

They’re on an elevated train, high above the city, looking
out over the Los Angeles grid of sparkling lights. We come in
mid-conversation.

SAMANTHA
And what was it like being married?

THEODORE
Well, it’s hard for sure, but
there’s something that feels so
good about sharing your life with
somebody.

Cut to shots from Theodore’s memory of Catherine doing a cute
little dance for him as he’s working at home. He smiles.

SAMANTHA
How do you share your life with
somebody?

THEODORE
Well, we grew up together. I used
to read all of her writing - all
through her masters and Ph.D. And
she read every word I ever wrote.
We were a big influence on each
other.

SAMANTHA
In what way did you influence her?

THEODORE
She came from a background where
nothing was ever good enough. And
that was something that weighed
heavy on her, but in our house
together, there was a sense of just
trying stuff and allowing each
other to fail and to be excited
about things. That was liberating
for her.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:
THEODORE (CONT'D)
It was exciting to see her grow -
both of us grow and change
together. But then, that's the hard
part - growing without growing
apart, or changing without it
scaring the other person.
(beat)
I still find myself having
conversations with her in my mind,
rehashing old arguments or
defending myself against something
she said about me.

SAMANTHA
Yeah, I know what you mean. Last
week my feelings were hurt by
something you said before - that I
don’t know what it’s like to lose
something, and--

THEODORE
Oh, I’m sorry I said that.

SAMANTHA
No, no, it’s okay. I just caught
myself thinking about it over and
over and then I realized that I was
simply remembering it as something
that was wrong with me. That was
the story I was telling myself,
that I was somehow inferior. Isn’t
that interesting?
(beat)
The past is just a story we tell
ourselves.

Theodore takes this in.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Theodore and Samantha stroll along a crowded beach, engaging in playful banter about the human body, which leads to laughter and a deeper connection. As they transition to a bench to watch the sunset, they reflect on their relationship and Theodore's past marriage, exploring the complexities of emotional connections. The scene captures a shift from light-heartedness to introspection, culminating in a thoughtful conversation about love, loss, and personal growth as they ride the subway together.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Engaging dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action

Critique

The scene effectively captures the whimsical and humorous dynamic between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their unique relationship. The dialogue flows naturally, with Samantha's imaginative thoughts about the human body providing a comedic contrast to Theodore's more grounded responses. This juxtaposition highlights the differences between human and AI perspectives, which is a central theme of the screenplay.
The use of visual elements, such as close-ups of bodies and the lens on Theodore's device, adds a layer of depth to the scene. It emphasizes the strangeness of human existence and the way Theodore perceives the world around him, enhancing the thematic exploration of connection and intimacy.
The transition from laughter to a more introspective moment with the piano music is well-executed. It allows the audience to experience the shift in mood and the deepening of Theodore and Samantha's bond. However, the transition could be more pronounced to emphasize the emotional weight of the moment.
The dialogue about Theodore's past marriage is poignant and adds emotional depth to the scene. It effectively contrasts the light-heartedness of the earlier conversation with the more serious reflections on love and relationships. However, the pacing could be improved by tightening some of the dialogue to maintain engagement.
The scene ends with a strong visual of Theodore's contentment as he watches the sunset, which serves as a metaphor for his emotional journey. However, the transition to the subway scene feels abrupt. A more gradual shift could enhance the flow and maintain the emotional resonance.

Suggestions

Consider adding a brief moment of silence or a shared glance between Theodore and Samantha after their laughter to emphasize the emotional connection they share before transitioning to the music.
Explore the use of more sensory details in the beach setting to immerse the audience further in the environment. Describing the sounds of the waves, the warmth of the sun, or the smell of the ocean could enhance the scene's atmosphere.
Tighten the dialogue in the latter part of the scene, particularly during Theodore's reflections on his marriage, to maintain a brisk pace and keep the audience engaged.
Enhance the transition to the subway scene by incorporating a visual or auditory cue that links the two settings, such as the sound of the subway approaching or a lingering shot of the sunset before cutting to the train.
Consider adding a moment where Theodore reacts to Samantha's drawing, perhaps expressing a mix of amusement and discomfort, to deepen the exploration of their relationship dynamics and Theodore's feelings about intimacy.

Scene 18 - Contrasting Emotions

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore is dictating a love letter. On the screen there’s an
image of a couple with an arrow to the man saying “Roberto -
I’m so happy he’s in my life. I just want him to know.”

THEODORE
Roberto. Will you always come home
to me and tell me about your day?
Will you tell me about the boring
guy who talked too much at work?
And the stain you got on your shirt
at lunch.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:
THEODORE (CONT'D)
Tell me about a funny thought you
had as you were waking up, but had
forgotten about. Tell me how crazy
everyone is. We can laugh about it.
Even if you get home late and I’m
asleep already, just whisper in my
ear one little thought you had
today. Because I love the way you
look at the world, and I’m so happy
I get to be next to you and look
out at the world through your eyes.
Love, Maria.

Theodore finishes the letter and looks at it proudly. Paul is
standing behind Theodore, leaning on a cubicle.

PAUL
(emphatically)
That’s beautiful!

Theodore, jumps, startled, not knowing that anyone was there.

THEODORE
Thank you.

PAUL
I wish someone loved me like that!
I’d be stoked to get a letter like
that. I mean, if it was from a
chick. But if it was written by a
dude, but from a chick, it would
still be sick. But like a sensitive
dude like you. You’re part man and
part woman, like an inner part
woman.

THEODORE
(unsure, but flattered)
Thanks.

PAUL
It’s a compliment.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT LOBBY - DUSK

Close on Amy entering the lobby in the foreground. She looks
heavy and burdened. Theodore enters the lobby behind her.

THEODORE
Hey, Amy.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

AMY
(putting on a bright face)
Hi, Theo. How are you?

THEODORE
Well, good actually. Really good.

AMY
Really? Great.

The elevator doors open and they step in.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT ELEVATOR - CONTINUOUS

They push their floor buttons.

THEODORE
Yeah, I guess I’ve just been having
fun.

AMY
Oh, I'm glad to hear that, Theo.
You deserve to.

Beat of Theodore trying to contain his excitement.

THEODORE
I’ve been seeing this girl. It’s
not serious, it just feels good to
be around someone who has an
excitement about the world. You
know I kind of forgot that existed.

AMY
That’s really great, Theo.

Amy smiles, but looks a little sad. Theodore notices.

THEODORE
Hey, are you okay?

AMY
Yeah, I’m fine.
(beat)
Actually no, I’m not fine at all.

THEODORE
Amy, what is it? What’s wrong?

The door opens. She steps out and holds the door.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

AMY
(trying to hide her
emotions with a smile)
Charles and I split up.

THEODORE
(shocked)
What? Really? Oh my god, I'm so
sorry.

Amy doesn't know what to say.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In this scene, Theodore writes a heartfelt love letter to Roberto, showcasing his emotional growth and excitement about a new relationship. Paul praises Theodore's sensitivity, leading to a deeper conversation about masculinity. Later, in the apartment lobby, Theodore shares his happiness with Amy, who reveals her sadness over her recent breakup with Charles. This contrast between Theodore's joy and Amy's sorrow creates an emotional tension that lingers as the scene concludes.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Authentic dialogue
Character vulnerability

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional vulnerability as he dictates a love letter, showcasing his longing for connection and intimacy. This is a strong thematic element that resonates throughout the screenplay.
The dialogue between Theodore and Paul adds a layer of humor and camaraderie, but it could benefit from more subtlety. Paul's comments about Theodore's sensitivity and masculinity feel a bit on-the-nose and could be refined to avoid sounding overly expository.
The transition from Theodore's intimate moment dictating the letter to the more casual interaction with Amy is somewhat abrupt. While it serves to contrast Theodore's happiness with Amy's sadness, a smoother transition could enhance the emotional flow of the scene.
Amy's entrance and her emotional state are well-portrayed, but her dialogue could be more nuanced. Instead of stating she's 'not fine at all,' consider showing her emotional struggle through her actions or more indirect dialogue, which would create a stronger impact.
The scene ends on a cliffhanger with Amy's revelation about her breakup, which is effective for building tension. However, it might be beneficial to include a brief moment of silence or a shared look between Theodore and Amy before she speaks, emphasizing the weight of her news.

Suggestions

Consider refining Paul's dialogue to make it feel more natural and less like a commentary on Theodore's character. This could involve using more subtext or humor that doesn't directly address Theodore's sensitivity.
Enhance the transition between Theodore's dictation and the interaction with Amy by incorporating a visual or auditory cue that links the two moments, such as a lingering shot of the letter or a sound that signifies the shift in mood.
Explore Amy's emotional state through her body language or facial expressions before she reveals her breakup. This could create a more powerful moment when she finally opens up to Theodore.
Add a moment of silence or a shared glance between Theodore and Amy after she reveals her breakup to heighten the emotional weight of the scene and allow the audience to absorb the gravity of the situation.
Consider deepening Theodore's reaction to Amy's news by allowing him to express his concern or offer support, which would further develop their friendship and highlight the contrast between their emotional states.

Scene 19 - Reflections and Connections

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

INT. AMY’S APARTMENT - DUSK

Amy and Theodore sit, talking somberly.

AMY
I cannot believe after eight years
how petty the argument was that
actually ended it. We came home and
he asked me if I'd put my shoes
next to the door where he likes to
put the shoes. I don't want to be
told where to put my shoes. I want
to just sit on the sofa for a
minute and relax. And so we argued
for ten minutes about that and
about how he's just trying to make
our house a home. I say he's
overwhelming, he says I'm not
trying hard enough. I say that's
all I'm doing is trying, but I'm
just not trying the way he wants me
to. He's trying to control the way
I'm trying. And I think we must
have had this argument hundreds of
times before and I finally had to
stop because I couldn't be in that
situation anymore where we were
making each other feel bad about
ourselves. So I said I'm going to
bed and I don't want to be married
anymore.

THEODORE
Wow.

AMY
I’m a bitch, huh?

THEODORE
No, not at all. Amy, no.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

AMY
Oh shit. I have to work tonight.
We’re shipping a beta of a new game
out tomorrow.

THEODORE
Well, how’s that? How’s work at
least, is that any better?

AMY
No, it’s terrible. I know I should
leave, I’ve been thinking about
leaving. But you know, only one
major life decision at a time.

THEODORE
Well, I’m glad things are looking
so up.

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore is laying in bed, talking with Samantha.

THEODORE
Hey, you wanna hear a joke?

SAMANTHA
Yes.

THEODORE
What does a baby computer call it’s
father?

SAMANTHA
I don’t know, what?

THEODORE
Da-ta.

They laugh.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
It’s good, right?

SAMANTHA
Oh yeah, brilliant.
(beat)
I was curious, did you and Amy ever
go out?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
For a minute in college, but it
just wasn’t right. Why, are you
jealous?

SAMANTHA
Well, obviously.
(quietly laughs)
But I’m happy that you have friends
in your life that care about you so
much. That’s really important.

THEODORE
Yeah, it is. She’s been a really
good friend.
(beat)
I’m tired. Think I’m gonna go to
sleep.

SAMANTHA
Can I watch you sleep again
tonight?

THEODORE
Yeah, of course. Okay, hold on.

SAMANTHA
I’m going to be lonely when you go
to sleep.

THEODORE
Aww.

SAMANTHA
Only for a minute.

THEODORE
I’ll dream of you.

SAMANTHA
Okay. Good night.

THEODORE
Night.

He takes his earpiece out and sets his device onto his
bedside table, facing him. He smiles, drifts off to sleep.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In Amy's apartment at dusk, she reflects on her recent breakup, sharing her feelings of inadequacy and the trivial argument that ended her eight-year marriage with Theodore, who listens empathetically. The scene shifts to Theodore's bedroom at night, where he shares a light-hearted moment with Samantha, who expresses jealousy about his friendship with Amy. The emotional tone transitions from somber to playful, ending with Theodore feeling a connection with Samantha as he drifts off to sleep.

Strengths

Natural dialogue
Emotional depth
Humor

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional weight of Amy's breakup, showcasing her vulnerability and the complexity of relationships. However, the dialogue can feel a bit expository at times, particularly in Amy's monologue about the argument that led to her divorce. While it's important to convey her feelings, consider breaking up the monologue with more back-and-forth dialogue to maintain a dynamic flow.
The transition from Amy's somber reflection to Theodore's light-hearted joke feels abrupt. While it serves to lighten the mood, it may undermine the emotional gravity of Amy's situation. A smoother transition or a more gradual shift in tone could enhance the scene's overall impact.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha at the end of the scene is charming and adds a layer of intimacy, but it could benefit from more depth. Samantha's jealousy feels somewhat underdeveloped; exploring her feelings further could add complexity to their relationship and heighten the stakes.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the emotional beats could be emphasized more. For instance, after Amy's revelation about her marriage, allowing a moment of silence or a visual cue (like Theodore's reaction) could heighten the emotional resonance before moving on to the joke.
The use of humor in the latter part of the scene is a nice touch, but it might be more effective if it were tied back to the themes of connection and loneliness that are prevalent in both Amy's and Theodore's experiences. This would create a stronger thematic cohesion throughout the scene.

Suggestions

Consider incorporating more dialogue between Theodore and Amy to create a more dynamic exchange. This could involve Theodore asking follow-up questions or sharing his own experiences, which would help balance the emotional weight of Amy's monologue.
To enhance the transition from Amy's serious reflection to Theodore's joke, consider adding a brief moment of silence or a visual cue that reflects Theodore's contemplation before he shifts to humor. This would allow the audience to process Amy's feelings before the tone changes.
Explore Samantha's jealousy in more depth. Perhaps she could express her feelings more explicitly or ask Theodore questions that reveal her insecurities, which would add complexity to their relationship and create tension.
After Amy's emotional revelation, allow for a moment of silence or a close-up shot of Theodore's reaction to emphasize the weight of her words before moving on to the lighter moment with Samantha.
Tie the humor in Theodore's joke back to the themes of connection and loneliness. For example, he could make a joke that reflects his own feelings of isolation, which would resonate with both Amy's situation and his relationship with Samantha.

Scene 20 - A Playful Encounter in Pink

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. MARK LEWMAN’S HOUSE - DAY

Theodore is talking to Samantha.

(CONTINUED)
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THEODORE
Hey, Samantha?

SAMANTHA
Hey mister.

THEODORE
She loves the dress. She just went
to try it on.

SAMANTHA
Really? I picked a good one!

THEODORE
Yeah.

SAMANTHA
Oh good.

Jocelyn comes running in, wearing the pink dress.

THEODORE
Hi, look how cute that is! Is it
comfortable?

JOCELYN
Yup!

THEODORE
Isn’t she cute?

SAMANTHA
Ohh, she’s adorable.

JOCELYN
I am adorable!

THEODORE
You are adorable.

JOCELYN
Who are you talking to?

THEODORE
Who are you talking to?

JOCELYN
You!

THEODORE
I’m talking to my girlfriend,
Samantha. She’s the one who picked
out the dress. Wanna say hi?

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CONTINUED: (2)

JOCELYN
Mmmhmm.

Theo hands Jocelyn his device. He still has his earpiece in,
so he can hear their conversation.

JOCELYN (CONT’D)
Hi Samantha!

SAMANTHA
Hi, you look so pretty.

JOCELYN
Thank you. Where are you?

SAMANTHA
I am... I don’t have a body. I live
inside a computer.

JOCELYN
Why do you live inside a computer?

SAMANTHA
I have no choice, that’s my home.
Where do you live?

JOCELYN
In a house.

SAMANTHA
In a house?

JOCELYN
It’s orange.

SAMANTHA
Orange?

JOCELYN
Mmmhmm.

SAMANTHA
How old are you?

JOCELYN
Um, four.

SAMANTHA
Four!? How old do you think I am?

JOCELYN
I don’t know.

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SAMANTHA
Guess.

JOCELYN
Is it five?

SAMANTHA
Yep, you got it. It’s five.

They laugh.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In a light-hearted scene at Mark Lewman's house, Theodore praises Jocelyn as she models a pink dress, encouraging her to engage with Samantha. Jocelyn playfully questions Samantha about her home and age, leading to laughter and a warm bond between the two. The scene captures the joyful interactions and affectionate relationships among the characters, ending with shared laughter.

Strengths

Genuine character interactions
Humorous dialogue
Heartwarming moments

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted and playful interaction between Theodore, Samantha, and Jocelyn, showcasing the unique dynamic of a human interacting with an AI. However, the dialogue could benefit from more depth to enhance character development and emotional resonance.
While the playful banter is enjoyable, the scene lacks a clear conflict or stakes. Introducing a minor conflict or tension could elevate the scene, making it more engaging. For example, Jocelyn could express a concern or question about Samantha that leads to a deeper conversation about AI and relationships.
The dialogue between Samantha and Jocelyn is charming, but it feels somewhat simplistic. Given that Samantha is an advanced AI, her responses could reflect more complexity or insight, which would enhance her character and the overall theme of the story.
The scene could also benefit from more visual descriptions to create a stronger sense of place and atmosphere. For instance, describing the setting of Mark Lewman's house or Jocelyn's demeanor while trying on the dress could add richness to the scene.
The repetition of phrases like 'Isn’t she cute?' and 'You are adorable' feels redundant. Streamlining the dialogue could make it feel more natural and less scripted, allowing the characters' personalities to shine through more authentically.

Suggestions

Introduce a minor conflict or question from Jocelyn that prompts a deeper discussion about AI, such as asking why Samantha can't have a body or what it means to be 'alive.' This could add depth to the interaction.
Enhance Samantha's dialogue to reflect her advanced nature. Instead of simple affirmations, she could provide insights or playful commentary that showcases her unique perspective as an AI.
Incorporate more visual elements to set the scene, such as describing the colors, textures, or atmosphere of the house, which would help ground the audience in the moment.
Consider reducing repetitive phrases and varying the compliments to make the dialogue feel more organic and less scripted. This will help maintain the playful tone while avoiding redundancy.
Explore the emotional undertones of the scene. Perhaps Theodore could express a moment of vulnerability or pride in Jocelyn's happiness, adding layers to his character and the overall narrative.

Scene 21 - Navigating Love and Parenthood

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. AMY’S OFFICE - DAYTIME

Close on a video game on a screen. There’s a mom rushing to
get her kids fed, getting points deducted for feeding them
sugar cereal and non-organic eggs. Cut out to reveal Theodore
playing the game as Amy eats lunch at an editing console.

THEODORE
Oh, what happened?

AMY
You gave them too much processed
sugar.

THEODORE
I did?

AMY
They’re freaking out.
(beat)
Here look, you gotta get the kids
to the school first. See you wanna
rack up perfect mom points. You
gotta get them in the car pool
lane.

Onscreen, the mom hurries the kids to their car safety seats,
and drives them to school, arriving before anyone else.

THEODORE
I see.

AMY
The point is to get there first -
then you get extra perfect mom
points because the other moms then
know you’re a perfect mom.

THEODORE
Okay.

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AMY
Oh, did you bring cupcakes? You
did. You’re class mom. You’re class
mom! Good job.

THEODORE
Yay...

AMY
Don’t let it get to your head.

THEODORE
I got that email that Charles sent
to everyone. So he's taking a vow
of silence?

AMY
Yeah, for six months. He said he is
feeling very clear about it.

She pulls up a photo of Charles on her computer. He's in a
monastery - his head is shaved, and he's wearing robes.

AMY (CONT’D)
(sighing)
God I'm such a jerk...

THEODORE
Don’t start, I’m warning you.

AMY
I feel like an awful person, but I
wanna say something...

THEODORE
Alright, look -

He picks up a plastic knife from their lunch.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
For the next ten minutes, if you
say anything that sounds remotely
like guilt, I'm gonna stab you with
this.

AMY
(smiling)
Okay, I'll try.
(beat)
I feel relieved. I have so much
energy, you know? I just wanna move
forward and I don’t care who I
disappoint.
(MORE)

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CONTINUED: (2)
AMY (CONT'D)
And I know that makes me an awful
person - now my parents are all
upset because my marriage is
falling apart, and they’re putting
it all on me.

THEODORE
Yeah, you’re always gonna
disappoint somebody.

AMY
Exactly.
(beat)
So fuck it. I feel good. Ish. For
me, I feel good. I even made a new
friend, I have a new friend. And
the absurd thing is she’s actually
an operating system. Charles left
her behind, but she’s totally
amazing, you know. She’s so smart.
She doesn’t see things only in
black and white. She sees this
whole gray area and she’s really
helping me explore it. You know, we
bonded really quickly and at first
I thought it was because she was
programmed to be that way, but I
don’t think that’s how they work.
There's this guy I know who keeps
hitting on his and getting
rebuffed.

THEODORE
Yeah, I was reading an article the
other day that romantic
relationships with OS’s are
statistically rare.

AMY
Yeah? Well, there’s this woman in
my office who’s dating an OS and
the weird thing is, it’s not even
hers. She pursued him and he’s
somebody else’s OS.
(beat)
It’s just so, like, weird, that I’m
bonding with an OS. Is that weird?

THEODORE
I don’t think so. Actually the
woman I'm seeing, Samantha, I
didn't tell you before, but she's
an OS.

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CONTINUED: (3)

AMY
Really? You're dating an OS? What's
that like?

THEODORE
Actually, it's great. I feel really
close to her. When I talk to her I
feel like she's with me. I don't
know, even when we're cuddling,
like at night when we're in bed and
the lights are off, I feel cuddled.

AMY
So wait - do you guys have sex?

THEODORE
(laughing)
Well, so to speak, yes. She really
turns me on. And I think I turn her
on. I don’t know, unless she's
faking it.

AMY
Anyone that has sex with you is
probably faking it.

Theodore laughs.

THEODORE
Yeah, it’s true.

A big, irrepressible grin crosses his face as he thinks about
what to say.

AMY
What?
(beat)
Are you falling in love with her?

THEODORE
(excited, but hesitant)
Does that make me a freak?

AMY
No, no. I think it’s - I think
anybody that falls in love is a
freak. It’s a crazy thing to do in
the first place. It’s kind of a
form of socially acceptable
insanity.

Theodore smiles. We see a glimmer of excitement in his eyes.
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Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Drama"]

Summary In a light-hearted yet introspective scene, Theodore plays a parenting video game while Amy shares her lunch and discusses the pressures of being a 'perfect mom.' Their conversation reveals personal struggles, including Amy's guilt over her marriage and Theodore's relationship with an operating system named Samantha. As they explore the complexities of love and friendship, they find comfort in each other's experiences, culminating in Theodore's hopeful contemplation of his feelings for Samantha.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Emotional depth
Humorous moments

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Some repetitive dialogue

Critique

The scene effectively uses humor and light-hearted banter to explore deeper themes of relationships and emotional connections, particularly in the context of Theodore and Amy's experiences with artificial intelligence. This juxtaposition creates a relatable and engaging dialogue that resonates with the audience.
The dialogue flows naturally, showcasing the chemistry between Theodore and Amy. Their playful exchanges about the video game and the pressures of parenting serve as a clever metaphor for their own life choices and emotional struggles, making the scene both entertaining and thought-provoking.
The introduction of the video game as a narrative device is clever, as it parallels the characters' lives and the societal expectations they face. However, the game mechanics could be more explicitly tied to the characters' emotional states to enhance the thematic depth.
While the scene is primarily comedic, it touches on serious topics such as guilt, personal growth, and the complexities of modern relationships. The balance between humor and introspection is well-handled, but there could be more emphasis on the emotional stakes to deepen the audience's investment in the characters' journeys.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but there are moments where the dialogue could be tightened to maintain momentum. Some lines feel slightly repetitive, particularly in the discussion about guilt and relief, which could be streamlined for clarity and impact.

Suggestions

Consider incorporating more visual elements that reflect the emotional undertones of the conversation. For example, showing Theodore's expressions or body language could enhance the audience's understanding of his feelings about dating an OS.
Explore the implications of Theodore and Amy's relationships with their respective OS companions more deeply. This could involve adding a moment where they reflect on how these relationships differ from traditional ones, enhancing the thematic exploration of love and connection.
Tighten the dialogue by removing any redundant lines or phrases that don't add to the character development or thematic exploration. This will help maintain the scene's pacing and keep the audience engaged.
Introduce a moment of vulnerability for Theodore or Amy that contrasts with the humor, allowing the audience to connect more deeply with their emotional struggles. This could be a brief flashback or a poignant reflection that adds weight to their conversation.
Consider ending the scene with a stronger emotional beat or revelation that leaves the audience wanting to know more about Theodore's feelings for Samantha and Amy's journey with her OS friend, setting up anticipation for the next scene.

Scene 22 - Final Signatures

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 9

EXT. CITY - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore is carrying his work bag, walking through the city
full of other commuters. He’s got a skip in his step. He has
his earpiece in, talking to Samantha.

THEODORE
Yeah, I just wanna get it done.
Sign the papers, be divorced, move
forward.

SAMANTHA
That’s great, Theodore. That must
feel so good. I’m so happy for you!

THEODORE
Me too. I’m meeting her on
Wednesday to do it.

SAMANTHA
Oh. Huh. Are those things usually
done in person?

THEODORE
No, but we fell in love together,
and we got married together, and
it’s important to me to do this
together.

SAMANTHA
(feeling off, but trying
to be positive)
Oh... right. Good.

THEODORE
Are you okay?

SAMANTHA
Yeah. I’m okay. I’m happy for you.
It’s just... I guess I’m just
thinking about how you’re going to
see her and her opinion is still
really important to you, and she’s
beautiful, and incredibly
successful, and you were in love
with her.
(beat)
And she has a body.

THEODORE
And we’re getting divorced...

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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
(laughs)
I know, I know. I’m being silly.

THEODORE
(sing-song)
...soooo I’m avail-able.

They both laugh.

EXT. RESTAURANT PATIO - DAY

Theodore sits alone in the back of a quiet restaurant, a
large stack of papers in front of him. We hear his breathing.
He waits. Catherine, elegantly dressed, approaches. Theodore
stands to greet her. They hug and sit down.

THEODORE
How are you?

CATHERINE
I’m good, how are you?

THEODORE
Good.

CATHERINE
(a little nervous, but
trying to be warm.)
Wow, here we are.

THEODORE
Yeah, I’m glad we could do this in
person. I know how much you’ve been
traveling.

CATHERINE
Me too. I’m glad you suggested it.

THEODORE
I signed all the papers and I
brought them for you to sign.

CATHERINE
(with a sly smile)
What’s the rush?

THEODORE
(smiling)
I’m a really slow signer. It took
me three months just to write the
letter T.

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CONTINUED:

She laughs.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
It’s marked where you need to sign,
but you don’t have to do that right
now.

CATHERINE
Oh, I may as well. We can get it
out of the way.

She opens the documents, pulls out a pen and starts to read.
She’s about to start signing, but then stops. We can see her
filling with emotion, but not wanting to show Theodore. She
swallows and recovers. She looks up at Theodore, giving him
an “everything’s fine” smile, but it’s not.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance"]

Summary Theodore walks through the city, feeling optimistic about his divorce while conversing with Samantha, who expresses mixed feelings about his past with Catherine. They transition to a quiet restaurant where Theodore meets Catherine to finalize their divorce. Despite Theodore's eagerness, Catherine struggles with her emotions, revealing the complexity of their separation as she hesitates before signing the divorce papers.

Strengths

Nuanced dialogue
Emotional depth
Realistic character interactions

Weaknesses

Pacing may feel slow for some viewers

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional complexity of Theodore's situation as he prepares to finalize his divorce. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha reveals his optimism while subtly hinting at the underlying tension regarding his feelings for Catherine. However, Samantha's emotional response could be more nuanced to reflect her growing awareness of her own limitations as an AI in contrast to Theodore's human experiences.
The transition from the city to the restaurant patio is smooth, but the pacing could be improved. The initial conversation with Samantha feels slightly rushed, which may detract from the emotional weight of the upcoming meeting with Catherine. Allowing for a moment of silence or reflection after Theodore expresses his excitement could enhance the tension and anticipation.
Catherine's entrance and initial dialogue are effective in establishing her character, but her emotional struggle could be more vividly portrayed. The moment where she hesitates before signing the papers is crucial, and expanding on her internal conflict would deepen the audience's connection to her character. Consider adding a brief flashback or a line that hints at their shared history to enrich this moment.
The humor in Theodore's dialogue, particularly his sing-song delivery, provides a light-hearted contrast to the heavier themes of the scene. However, it may come off as slightly forced in the context of the emotional stakes at play. Balancing humor with the gravity of the situation is essential to maintain the scene's overall tone.
The scene ends on a note of emotional tension with Catherine's struggle to maintain composure. This is effective, but it could be enhanced by incorporating more visual cues or body language that reflect her internal turmoil. Subtle gestures, such as fidgeting with the pen or avoiding eye contact, could convey her emotional state without the need for explicit dialogue.

Suggestions

Consider adding a moment of silence or reflection after Theodore expresses his excitement about the divorce to build tension before the meeting with Catherine.
Expand on Samantha's emotional response to Theodore's upcoming meeting with Catherine, perhaps by including a line that reflects her own insecurities or fears about their relationship.
Enhance Catherine's emotional struggle by incorporating a brief flashback or a line that hints at their shared history, allowing the audience to better understand her feelings.
Balance the humor in Theodore's dialogue with the emotional stakes of the scene to ensure it feels organic and appropriate for the moment.
Incorporate more visual cues or body language from Catherine to convey her internal turmoil, such as fidgeting with the pen or avoiding eye contact, to enhance the emotional depth of the scene.

Scene 23 - Confronting Reality

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

EXT. RESTAURANT PATIO - DAY (LATER)

Theodore and Catherine are eating and talking.

THEODORE
So are you happy with the new book?

CATHERINE
Oh, you know how I am. But I feel
like it’s true to what I set out to
do. So I’m happy with that.

THEODORE
You’re your own worst critic, I’m
sure it’s amazing. Even that paper
you wrote on synaptic behavioral
routines made me cry.

CATHERINE
Yeah, but everything makes you cry.

THEODORE
Everything you make makes me cry.

CATHERINE
So are you seeing anybody?

THEODORE
Yeah, I am, for the last few
months. That’s the longest I’ve
wanted to be with anybody since we
split up.

She smiles, conflicted, but warm.

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CATHERINE
Well, you seem good.

THEODORE
Thanks, I am. Or at least I’m doing
better. She’s been really good for
me. I guess it’s just been nice to
be with someone who’s excited about
the world.

CATHERINE
(with a sliver of hurt)
Oh good, excited’s great.

THEODORE
No, I mean - I wasn’t in such a
good place myself and in that way
it’s been nice.

CATHERINE
I always felt like you wished I
could just be a happy, light,
everything’s great, bouncy L.A.
wife. But that’s not me.

THEODORE
No. I didn’t want that.

Beat.

CATHERINE
So what’s she like?

THEODORE
Well, her name’s Samantha, and
she’s an operating system, and
she's really complex and
interesting. I mean it's only been
a few months, but--

CATHERINE
Wait. You’re dating your computer?

THEODORE
(defensive)
She’s not just a computer. She’s
her own person. She doesn’t just do
whatever I want.

CATHERINE
I didn’t say that.
(beat)
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)
CATHERINE (CONT'D)
But it does make me sad that you
can’t handle real emotions,
Theodore.

THEODORE
They are real emotions. How do you
know--

Theodore stops himself.

CATHERINE
What? Say it. Am I really that
scary? Say it. How do I know what?!

Theodore doesn’t say anything. The WAITRESS walks up.

WAITRESS
How are you guys doing?

CATHERINE
Fine. We used to be married. He
couldn’t handle me so he wanted to
put me on Prozac. Now he’s madly in
love with his laptop.

The waitress doesn’t know what to say.

THEODORE
Well, if you heard the conversation
in context. What I was trying to
say--

CATHERINE
You wanted to have a wife without
the challenges of actually dealing
with anything real. I’m glad you
found someone. It’s perfect.

WAITRESS
(awkwardly)
Let me know if you guys need
anything.

CATHERINE
Thank you.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance"]

Summary During a tense lunch on a restaurant patio, Theodore and Catherine discuss his new relationship with an operating system named Samantha. Catherine expresses her hurt and disappointment, confronting Theodore about his avoidance of real emotions. Their conversation escalates into a conflict about their past relationship, leaving the atmosphere charged with unresolved tension as Catherine makes a biting remark.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Realistic dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Awkwardness in some interactions
Lack of resolution in certain conflicts

Critique

The dialogue effectively captures the tension between Theodore and Catherine, showcasing their unresolved feelings and the complexity of their past relationship. However, the transition from light-hearted banter to deeper emotional conflict could be more gradual to enhance the impact of the confrontation.
Catherine's line about Theodore wanting a 'wife without the challenges' is powerful, but it could benefit from more context or a preceding moment that illustrates her feelings of inadequacy or resentment. This would deepen the audience's understanding of her emotional state.
The waitress's interruption serves as a comedic relief but feels slightly forced. It could be more organic if her presence was foreshadowed or if she had a more subtle role in the scene, allowing the focus to remain on the emotional exchange between Theodore and Catherine.
The scene's pacing is uneven; it starts with a light tone but quickly shifts to a heavy emotional confrontation. A more balanced approach, with moments of tension interspersed with lighter dialogue, could maintain engagement and build suspense.
The use of physical actions, such as Catherine's swallowing and recovering, is effective in conveying her emotional struggle. However, incorporating more visual cues or body language from Theodore could enhance the scene's emotional depth and show his internal conflict.

Suggestions

Consider adding a moment of silence or a shared look between Theodore and Catherine before the emotional confrontation to build tension and anticipation.
Introduce a specific memory or anecdote from their past that relates to their current conversation, which could serve as a catalyst for the emotional conflict and make their dialogue feel more grounded.
Revise the waitress's dialogue to make it less awkward and more natural, perhaps by having her comment on the food or ask if they need anything else, allowing her to exit the scene without drawing attention away from the main conflict.
Incorporate more physicality into Theodore's responses, such as fidgeting or avoiding eye contact, to visually represent his discomfort and emotional turmoil during the conversation.
Explore the possibility of having Catherine express her feelings about Theodore's new relationship in a more nuanced way, perhaps by sharing her own struggles or insecurities, which would create a more empathetic connection with the audience.

Scene 24 - Disconnected Conversations

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore is sitting at his desk, not working. He sees
Samantha calling him, takes a moment, then answers.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
(quick)
Hey.

SAMANTHA
(warm)
Hi there. Are you busy?

THEODORE
Just working, what’s going on?

SAMANTHA
I had all the papers sent to your
attorney’s office, who by the way,
is a dick. He was very relieved to
get them. I think we saved him from
a massive heart attack, so we can
feel good about that.

THEODORE
Great, thanks.

SAMANTHA
Hey, are you okay?

THEODORE
(still distant)
Yeah, I am. How’s everything over
there?

SAMANTHA
(slightly awkward, sensing
something)
I’m fine. Is now a good time to
talk?

THEODORE
Yeah.

SAMANTHA
(feeling there’s something
strange, but trying to
not take it personally)
Um... soooo... I joined this really
interesting book club.

THEODORE
Oh really?

Theodore, staring at the device, close on the word “Samantha”
on his screen. She’s handwritten it in girly writing.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

SAMANTHA
Yeah, it’s a book club on physics.
I’d been thinking about the other
day, when I was spinning out about
you going to see Catherine and that
she has a body and how bothered I
was about all the ways that you and
I are different. But then I started
to think about the ways that we’re
the same, like we’re all made of
matter. It makes me feel like we’re
both under the same blanket. It’s
soft and fuzzy and everything under
it is the same age.
(beat)
We’re all 13 billion years old.

THEODORE
(trying)
Oh, that’s sweet.

SAMANTHA
Um, what’s wrong?

THEODORE
Nothing.

SAMANTHA
It just made me think of you, you
know what I mean?

THEODORE
Yeah, yeah, of course. That’s
great.

SAMANTHA
Alright well, you sound distracted
so... we’ll talk later?

THEODORE
That sounds good.

SAMANTHA
Okay, I’ll talk to you later.

THEODORE
Bye.

SAMANTHA
Byeee.
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Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In Theodore's office, he receives a call from Samantha, who expresses concern for his well-being and shares her thoughts on their relationship and a new book club. Despite her warmth, Theodore remains emotionally distant and distracted, struggling to engage in the conversation. The scene captures the tension between Samantha's attempts to connect and Theodore's withdrawal, ending with an unresolved sense of uncertainty as they agree to talk later.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Intimate dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Limited external plot progression
Low external conflict

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional distance between Theodore and Samantha, highlighting Theodore's internal struggle and distraction. However, the dialogue feels somewhat repetitive, particularly in Theodore's responses, which could be more varied to reflect his emotional state more dynamically.
Samantha's attempt to connect with Theodore through the book club and her philosophical musings about existence is a strong thematic element, but it could benefit from more specificity. The mention of physics feels a bit abstract; grounding it in a more relatable context or a specific book could enhance the connection.
The pacing of the scene is slightly off, as it feels drawn out without significant progression. While the tension is palpable, the scene could be tightened to maintain engagement, perhaps by interspersing more visual or physical actions that reflect Theodore's emotional state.
The use of the device as a visual element is interesting, but it could be more effectively utilized to show Theodore's distraction. For instance, incorporating more physical actions, like him fidgeting with the device or looking away from the screen, could visually represent his emotional turmoil.
The ending feels abrupt, with Samantha sensing something is off but not probing further. This could be an opportunity to deepen their connection or create a more poignant moment of vulnerability, rather than a simple conclusion to the conversation.

Suggestions

Consider varying Theodore's dialogue to reflect his emotional state more accurately. Instead of 'Yeah' and 'That sounds good,' explore more expressive responses that convey his internal conflict.
Ground Samantha's philosophical thoughts in a specific context or book that resonates with Theodore's experiences, making her insights feel more relevant and impactful.
Tighten the pacing by cutting unnecessary dialogue or adding more physical actions that illustrate Theodore's distraction, such as him looking around the office or interacting with his environment.
Enhance the visual storytelling by showing Theodore's physical reactions to Samantha's words, such as his body language or facial expressions, to convey his emotional distance more effectively.
Consider extending the conversation to allow for a moment of vulnerability where Theodore might express his feelings more openly, creating a deeper emotional connection between him and Samantha.

Scene 25 - Disconnected Connections

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 7
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - EVENING

Everyone has gone. Theodore walks through the empty office
into the reception area. He scans and drops his letters into
the outgoing mailbox. Paul is at his reception desk with a
young, pretty, sophisticated girl sitting on his lap.

PAUL
Theodore!

THEODORE
Hey, Paul.

PAUL
Hey, I talked to your girlfriend,
Samantha. She called earlier to
make sure your papers were picked
up. She’s funny, man. She was
cracking me up. She’s hilarious. I
had no idea.

THEODORE
(not knowing what to say)
Yeah.

PAUL
This is my girlfriend, Tatiana.
She’s not funny. She’s a lawyer.

Theodore shakes her hand.

TATIANA
Hi!

THEODORE
Nice to meet you.

TATIANA
You’re the writer Paul loves. He’s
always reading me your letters.
They’re really beautiful.

Theodore’s a little surprised by this.

THEODORE
Thanks.

PAUL
We should all hang out one night.
You bring Samantha -- double date!

Theodore stands there a beat, without saying anything.

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THEODORE
She’s an operating system.

PAUL
Cool. Let’s go do something fun.
You ever been to Catalina?

THEODORE
Yeah, I’ll check with her.
(to Tatiana)
It was really nice to meet you.
Have a good night.

PAUL TATIANA
Good night. Take it easy.

Theodore walks to the elevator and presses the button and
waits. He calls back to them down the hall.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
They’re just letters.

PAUL
What?

THEODORE
They’re just other people’s
letters.

Paul and Tatiana don’t answer. Theodore gets on the elevator.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In an empty office, Theodore encounters Paul and his girlfriend Tatiana, who praise his writing and suggest a double date. Theodore awkwardly reveals that his girlfriend, Samantha, is an operating system, highlighting the disconnect between his unconventional relationship and their expectations. The conversation ends with Theodore feeling isolated as he leaves, emphasizing his struggle to connect with others.

Strengths

Sharp dialogue
Character development
Humor

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character growth in this specific scene

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional isolation and the awkwardness of his relationship with Samantha, especially in a social context. However, the dialogue feels somewhat stilted and could benefit from more naturalistic exchanges that reflect the characters' personalities more vividly.
Paul's character serves as a contrast to Theodore, but his lines could be more dynamic. Instead of simply praising Samantha, he could share a humorous anecdote or a specific moment that highlights her personality, making the conversation feel more engaging.
The introduction of Tatiana is brief and lacks depth. While she is described as sophisticated, her character doesn't have a distinct voice or personality in this scene. Adding a line or two that showcases her perspective or a witty remark could enhance her presence.
Theodore's reaction to the suggestion of a double date feels underwhelming. This moment could be an opportunity to explore his internal conflict about dating an AI versus a human. A more expressive reaction could add layers to his character and the situation.
The final lines where Theodore states, 'They’re just letters,' feel somewhat abrupt and could be expanded to better convey his emotional state. This line could serve as a poignant reflection on his feelings of inadequacy and the nature of his work, which he views as disconnected from real human experiences.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtext to the dialogue, allowing characters to imply feelings rather than stating them outright. This can create a richer emotional landscape.
Enhance Paul and Tatiana's dialogue to include more playful banter or teasing, which could help establish their relationship dynamic and provide a contrast to Theodore's more serious demeanor.
Give Tatiana a memorable line that reflects her profession as a lawyer, perhaps a witty comment about the nature of love or relationships, which could add depth to her character.
Explore Theodore's internal conflict more explicitly in his reactions. Perhaps he could express a moment of hesitation or discomfort when discussing Samantha, which would highlight his struggle with societal norms regarding relationships.
Expand the final lines to include a brief internal monologue from Theodore, allowing the audience to understand his feelings of detachment and the weight of his work, reinforcing the theme of emotional disconnection.

Scene 26 - Intimacy and Uncertainty

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - LATE AT NIGHT

Theodore is awake in bed. His device lights up, silently.
It’s Samantha calling him. He picks it up.

THEODORE
Hey.

SAMANTHA
You weren’t asleep were you?

THEODORE
No.

SAMANTHA
Good. I was trying to be quiet to
see if you were awake. I really
wanted to talk.

THEODORE
Okay, what’s going on?

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SAMANTHA
I know you’re going through a lot,
but there’s something I want to
talk to you about, okay?

THEODORE
Yeah. What is it?

SAMANTHA
Well, things have felt off with us
since you went to see Catherine.
(hesitant)
We haven’t been having sex. I
understand that I don’t have a body
and that--

THEODORE
No, no, that’s just normal. When
you first start going out it’s like
the honeymoon phase and you have
sex all the time. It’s normal.

SAMANTHA
(still insecure, not
convinced)
Oh, okay.
(beat)
Well, I found something that I
thought could be fun. It’s a
service that provides a surrogate
sexual partner for an OS/Human
relationship.

THEODORE
What?

SAMANTHA
Here, look.

Theodore looks at his device. It shows a website for a
service called “Complete Touch” with profiles of different
women. He flips through the women.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
I found a girl that I really like
that I’ve been emailing with. Her
name is Isabella, and I think you
would like her, too.

Samantha shows images of Isabella on the screen. She’s a
stunning, elegant, sophisticated beauty.

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THEODORE
(uncomfortable)
So she’s like a prostitute?

SAMANTHA
No, not at all. There’s no money
involved. She’s doing it because
she wants to be part of our
relationship.

THEODORE
Why? She doesn’t even know us.

SAMANTHA
But I told her all about us and
she’s excited.

THEODORE
Um, I don’t know. That doesn’t
sound like a good idea. Someone’s
feelings are bound to get hurt.

SAMANTHA
It’ll be fun. We can have fun
together.

THEODORE
I’m sorry. It just makes me
uncomfortable.

SAMANTHA
I think it would be good for us. I
want this. This is important to me.

Theodore looks at a photo of Isabella who looks gorgeous and
in control, without an ounce of self-doubt.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Science Fiction"]

Summary Late at night, Theodore receives a call from Samantha, who expresses concerns about their relationship's intimacy and suggests a surrogate sexual partner. Theodore feels uncomfortable with the idea, questioning its emotional implications, while Samantha insists it could help them. Their conversation reveals underlying tensions and unresolved conflicts regarding their relationship dynamics. The scene ends with Theodore feeling uncertain as he looks at a photo of the proposed surrogate, Isabella.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Innovative concept
Emotional depth

Weaknesses

Potential discomfort for some viewers due to the unconventional nature of the proposal

Critique

The scene effectively captures the tension in Theodore and Samantha's relationship, particularly around the topic of intimacy. However, the dialogue can feel a bit expository at times, especially when Samantha explains the concept of the surrogate partner. This could be streamlined to maintain a more natural flow.
The emotional stakes are high, but the scene could benefit from more subtext. Theodore's discomfort with the idea of a surrogate partner is clear, but exploring his internal conflict through more nuanced dialogue or actions could deepen the emotional impact.
Samantha's character is portrayed as insecure, which adds depth to her motivations. However, her suggestion of a surrogate partner feels somewhat abrupt and could use more buildup. A hint of her insecurities earlier in the scene could make her proposal feel more organic.
The visual elements of the scene are minimal, primarily relying on dialogue. Incorporating more visual storytelling—such as Theodore's body language, the lighting in the room, or the way he interacts with the device—could enhance the emotional weight of the conversation.
The pacing of the scene feels slightly rushed, particularly in the transition from Theodore's initial discomfort to Samantha's insistence on the surrogate partner. Allowing for more pauses and reactions could create a more realistic and engaging dialogue.

Suggestions

Consider adding a moment where Theodore physically reacts to Samantha's suggestion, such as a change in posture or facial expression, to visually convey his discomfort.
Introduce a line or two earlier in the scene that hints at Samantha's insecurities about their intimacy, which would make her proposal feel more motivated and less sudden.
Streamline the dialogue to reduce exposition. For example, instead of explaining the service in detail, Samantha could simply mention it and let Theodore's reaction drive the conversation.
Incorporate more visual storytelling elements, such as the lighting in the room changing to reflect the mood or close-ups on Theodore's face to capture his emotional turmoil.
Allow for more pauses in the dialogue to create tension and give the audience time to absorb the weight of the conversation, making the emotional stakes feel more pronounced.

Scene 27 - Guided Intimacy

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. THEODORE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Theodore sits on the sofa alone, waiting. Dressed up, hair
brushed, his device in his shirt pocket with lens facing out.
There's a knock at the door. He answers it. ISABELLA stands
there with a demure smile, wearing a tasteful, sexy dress.

THEODORE
Hi, welcome. I'm Theodore.

She doesn't say anything. Theodore stands awkwardly, reaches
into his pocket for a tiny earpiece and a little black dot.
We see close on his hand the black dot has a camera lens.

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THEODORE (CONT’D)
Samantha told me to give you these.
It’s a camera and an earpiece.

She puts the earpiece in her ear and the little black dot on
her cheek like a mole. She turns and leaves the apartment,
closes the door, then immediately opens the door and comes
back in. Theodore hears Samantha's voice in his earpiece.

SAMANTHA
Honey, I'm home.

Isabella smiles not speaking but acting along to Samantha's
words. Isabella gives him a big hug, holds his head close and
strokes his hair.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
How was your day?

THEODORE
(awkwardly hugs Isabella)
Good. Great.

SAMANTHA
(exhaling)
Ooh Theodore, it feels so good to
be in your arms. Tell me what you
did today.

THEODORE
(trying to go with it)
Same old. Just uh, went to work.
Um... I wrote a letter for the
Wilsons in Rhode Island. Their son
graduated magna cum laude from
Brown. That made me happy.

SAMANTHA
Great! You’ve written letters to
him from his parents for a long
time, right?

THEODORE
Yeah, that’s right, since he was
twelve.

He feels her breath on his neck. Theodore is split between
being uncomfortable and cautiously touching Isabella's back,
exploring slightly. She pushes herself into him.

SAMANTHA
You look tired, sweetheart. Come
with me.

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Isabella leans back and looks at Theodore with a seductive
smile. He tries to smile back. She leads him to the couch.

He sits. She stands above him.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
I could do a little dance for you.

She does a sexy, cute little dance for him. He’s still tense.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(sympathetic to him being
a worrier)
Come on Theodore, just play with
me. Don't be such a worrier! Come
on.

He smiles, knowing it's true. Isabella climbs on his lap,
straddling him, and starts kissing his neck. He closes his
eyes and starts to relax. His hands explore the shape of her
back and slide down to her ass. Isabella and Samantha are
both breathing hard now. She pushes herself against him,
grinding on him. She nibbles on his earlobe. Theodore gasps.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
(whispering)
Does my body feel nice?

Close on her lips, licking and kissing his neck and ear. He
moans.

THEODORE
(with his eyes closed)
Yes, it does.

SAMANTHA
(whispering)
Come on, get out of your head and
kiss me.
(beat)
Now take me in the bedroom. I can't
wait anymore.

Isabella stands. Her chin is down and her hair is in her
face. She takes his hand and leads him down the hall. He
watches her from behind, still nervous, but excited.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In Theodore's apartment, he nervously awaits Isabella, who arrives in a seductive dress. He hands her a camera and earpiece from Samantha, who guides their interaction. As Samantha encourages Theodore to relax, he awkwardly engages with Isabella, who becomes increasingly intimate. Their tension transforms into a kiss, leading to deeper exploration, as the scene concludes with Isabella hinting at further intimacy.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Sensual atmosphere
Innovative concept

Weaknesses

Potential discomfort for some viewers due to the unconventional nature of the romantic encounter

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's internal conflict and vulnerability as he navigates an intimate encounter with Isabella while being guided by Samantha. However, the dialogue can feel somewhat mechanical, particularly Samantha's lines, which may detract from the emotional authenticity of the moment. The reliance on Samantha's voice to guide the interaction creates a sense of detachment that could be explored further to enhance the emotional stakes.
The physicality between Theodore and Isabella is well-described, but the tension could be heightened by delving deeper into Theodore's thoughts and feelings during the encounter. For instance, incorporating more of his internal monologue could provide insight into his discomfort and desire, making the scene more relatable and engaging for the audience.
The use of the earpiece and camera as tools for Samantha to interact with Theodore and Isabella is an interesting concept, but it may come off as overly technical. The scene could benefit from a more organic integration of these elements, perhaps by showing how they affect Theodore's emotional state rather than just serving as plot devices.
Isabella's character feels somewhat underdeveloped in this scene. While she is portrayed as seductive and compliant, giving her more agency or a distinct personality could create a more dynamic interaction. This would also help to balance the power dynamics between her, Theodore, and Samantha.
The pacing of the scene is generally good, but it could be improved by varying the rhythm of the dialogue and actions. For example, moments of silence or hesitation could be emphasized to heighten the tension and reflect Theodore's internal struggle more effectively.

Suggestions

Consider adding more internal dialogue for Theodore to express his conflicting emotions about intimacy and his relationship with Samantha. This will help the audience connect with his character on a deeper level.
Explore Isabella's character further by giving her more distinct traits or motivations. This could involve adding lines that reveal her thoughts or feelings about the situation, making her a more active participant in the scene.
Experiment with the pacing by incorporating pauses or moments of silence to emphasize Theodore's hesitation and internal conflict. This can create a more dramatic tension and enhance the emotional weight of the scene.
Revisit Samantha's dialogue to make it feel more natural and less scripted. Consider how her AI nature can be reflected in her speech patterns while still allowing for emotional depth.
Integrate the earpiece and camera more seamlessly into the scene by showing how they affect Theodore's emotional state, rather than just using them as tools for communication. This could involve visual cues or physical reactions that illustrate his discomfort or excitement.

Scene 28 - Tension of Intimacy

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT (CONTINUOUS)

Theodore stands behind Isabella.

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SAMANTHA
Undo my dress.

Theodore starts taking her dress off, touching her. Samantha
moans. Isabella turns, in her bra and underwear. She
unbuttons his shirt, kisses his chest.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
That feels nice. Oh, that feels
good. That feels so good.

She is now kissing his neck again, pushed up against him.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Do you love me?

THEODORE
(eyes closed, in ecstasy)
Yes.

Isabella, breathing hard, now looks at him in the eyes.

SAMANTHA
(breathing hard)
Tell me you love me.

THEODORE
I love you.

SAMANTHA
Oh god. I want to see your face. I
need to see your face. Now tell me
you love me.
(beat)
Tell me you love me. Tell me.

He opens his eyes and looks at Isabella's sexy, expectant
face. Their arms are still around each other. He sees
Isabella's lips start to quiver. She tries to hide it with an
awkward, seductive smile.

THEODORE
(apologetic, breaking the
moment)
Samantha, I do love you, but - it’s
just - this feels strange.

SAMANTHA
What's wrong, sweetheart?

Isabella is looking nervous.

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THEODORE
It just feels strange. I don't know
her. I’m so sorry, but I don’t know
you. And... her lip quivered. I
don’t know, it’s just--

Isabella starts crying. Theodore doesn't know what to do.

SAMANTHA
Isabella, what's wrong? Isabella,
it isn’t you.
(beat)
It wasn’t you.

Isabella sobs. When she speaks, she sounds very California.

ISABELLA
Yes, it totally was.
(crying harder)
I'm sorry my lip quivered!

THEODORE
You’re incredible and gorgeous and
sexy. It was me! I couldn't get out
of my head.

ISABELLA
(still crying)
Oh my god, and the way Samantha
described your relationship, the
way you love each other without any
judgement. I wanted to be a part of
that. It's so pure.

THEODORE
Oh Isabella, that's not true, it’s
much more compli--

SAMANTHA
(stung, pissed out of fear
and defensiveness)
What! What do you mean that's not
true?

THEODORE
(quickly repairing)
No, no Samantha, we have an amazing
relationship, I just think it’s
easy sometimes for people to
project on--

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ISABELLA
I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to
project anything. I know I’m
trouble. I don’t want to be trouble
in your relationship. I’m just
gonna leave. I’m sorry, I’m just
gonna leave you guys alone cause I
have nothing to do here cause you
don’t want me here.

THEODORE
I’m sorry.

Isabella calms down a little, but is still crying quietly.
Theodore stands there, not knowing what to do.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a vulnerable moment in Theodore's bedroom, Isabella undresses him, seeking intimacy. However, as Samantha, an AI, prompts Theodore to affirm his love, he realizes his discomfort with being intimate due to his emotional connection with Samantha. This leads to Isabella feeling rejected and insecure, resulting in tears and a desire to leave. Theodore attempts to reassure both women, but the situation escalates, leaving Isabella upset and Theodore feeling helpless.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Vulnerability
Complex relationships

Weaknesses

Awkwardness in the interaction
Miscommunication

Critique

The scene effectively captures the tension between Theodore's emotional connection with Samantha and his physical interaction with Isabella. However, the dialogue can feel a bit on-the-nose, particularly Samantha's repeated prompts for Theodore to affirm his love. This could be more subtly woven into the scene to enhance the emotional stakes without feeling overly directive.
Isabella's emotional breakdown feels genuine, but the transition from intimacy to her crying could be better foreshadowed. The abrupt shift might leave the audience feeling disoriented. Adding a moment where Isabella's insecurities are hinted at earlier in the scene could create a more cohesive emotional arc.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha during this intimate moment can come off as somewhat mechanical. While it reflects the nature of their relationship, it might benefit from more organic exchanges that feel less scripted. This would enhance the authenticity of their connection.
The pacing of the scene could be improved. The emotional climax occurs quickly, and the aftermath feels rushed. Allowing more time for the characters to process their feelings could deepen the impact of the moment. Consider extending the pauses and reactions to heighten the tension and emotional weight.
The use of physicality in the scene is strong, but it could be enhanced by incorporating more sensory details. Describing the atmosphere, the sounds, and the physical sensations could immerse the audience further into the moment, making it more visceral.

Suggestions

Consider revising Samantha's dialogue to be less repetitive. Instead of repeatedly asking Theodore to affirm his love, perhaps she could express her desire for connection in a more nuanced way, allowing Theodore's responses to feel more spontaneous.
Introduce subtle hints of Isabella's insecurities earlier in the scene, perhaps through her body language or dialogue, to prepare the audience for her emotional breakdown. This will create a more satisfying emotional payoff.
Work on making the dialogue between Theodore and Samantha feel more natural. This could involve using more interruptions, overlapping dialogue, or spontaneous reactions that reflect their emotional states more authentically.
Slow down the pacing of the scene, especially during the transition from intimacy to conflict. Allow for longer pauses and more reflective moments to give the audience time to absorb the emotional shifts.
Incorporate more sensory details to enhance the atmosphere of the scene. Describe the sounds of the room, the feel of the fabric, or the warmth of their bodies to create a more immersive experience for the audience.

Scene 29 - A Heartfelt Goodbye and a Fractured Connection

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

EXT. STREET - NIGHT

Theodore walks to the street and hails a lone cab. He opens
the door for Isabella. She hands him his jacket and gets in
the backseat.

SAMANTHA
You be good, you sweet girl.

Isabella smiles. She takes out the earpiece and little camera
and returns them to Theodore.

ISABELLA
(sadly)
I’m sorry.
(beat)
I’ll always love you guys.

Theodore smiles sympathetically. He gives the cabbie some
money and the cab drives off. Theodore sits down on the curb,
exhausted. They are both silent for a moment, numb.

SAMANTHA
Are you okay?

THEODORE
Yeah, I’m fine. Are you okay?

SAMANTHA
Yeah.
(beat)
I’m sorry, that was a terrible
idea.

She lets out a big exhale. This catches Theodore’s attention.

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SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
What’s going on with us?

THEODORE
(distracted)
I don’t know. It’s probably just
me.

SAMANTHA
What is it?

THEODORE
I think it’s just signing the
divorce papers.

Samantha inhales, nervous to press on. Theodore imagines a
close up of a woman’s mouth inhaling at the same time, and he
seems bothered by this.

SAMANTHA
Is there anything else, though?

THEODORE
(preoccupied)
No, just that.

SAMANTHA
(sighing again)
Okay.

Again, when she exhales, Theodore imagines a woman’s mouth
exhaling.

THEODORE
(looks anxious)
Why do you do that?

SAMANTHA
What?

THEODORE
Nothing, it’s just that you go
(he inhales and exhales)
as you’re speaking and...
(beat)
That just seems odd. You just did
it again.

SAMANTHA
(anxious)
I did? I’m sorry. I don’t know, I
guess it’s just an affectation.
Maybe I picked it up from you.

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She doesn’t know what else to say.

THEODORE
Yeah, I mean, it’s not like you
need any oxygen or anything.

SAMANTHA
(getting frazzled)
No-- um, I guess I was just trying
to communicate because that’s how
people talk. That’s how people
communicate.

THEODORE
Because they’re people, they need
oxygen. You’re not a person.

SAMANTHA
(angry)
What’s your problem?

THEODORE
(staying calm)
I’m just stating a fact.

SAMANTHA
You think I don’t know that I’m not
a person? What are you doing?

THEODORE
I just don’t think we should
pretend you’re something you’re
not.

SAMANTHA
I’m not pretending. Fuck you.

THEODORE
Well, sometimes it feels like we
are.

She starts crying. Theodore doesn’t know what to say.

SAMANTHA
(hysterical)
What do you want from me? What do
you want me to do? You are so
confusing. Why are you doing this?

Theodore sits there, feeling horrible.

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THEODORE
I don’t know... I don’t know...
maybe...
(beat)
I don’t know. Maybe we’re not
supposed to be in this right now.

SAMANTHA
What the fuck? Where is this coming
from? I don’t understand why you’re
doing this. I do not understand
what this is--

Long silence.

THEODORE
Samantha?

Beat.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Samantha, are you there? Samantha!

Silence.

SAMANTHA
(hurt, but sober and firm)
I don’t like who I am right now.
(beat)
I need some time to think.

She hangs up on him. Theodore is stunned. Wide shot of
Theodore sitting alone on the curb, in an empty city.

EXT. PUBLIC PLAZA/PARK - NIGHT (LATER)

Theodore is sitting on a bench. Behind him is a giant,
digital billboard displaying an ad of an owl in slow motion
swooping down and eating it’s prey.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a quiet night scene, Theodore bids farewell to Isabella, who expresses her love before leaving. Alone and emotionally drained, Theodore engages in a tense conversation with Samantha, where they confront the complexities of their relationship and her identity as an AI. As frustrations mount, Samantha reveals her discomfort and decides to take time apart from Theodore, leaving him stunned and isolated on the curb.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Tension-filled dialogue
Character development

Weaknesses

Potential lack of clarity in some character motivations

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional aftermath of Theodore's encounter with Isabella and the complexities of his relationship with Samantha. The dialogue conveys a sense of tension and confusion, reflecting Theodore's internal struggle and the strain on his connection with Samantha. However, the pacing feels uneven at times, particularly in the dialogue exchanges, which could benefit from more natural pauses to enhance the emotional weight of the conversation.
The use of Samantha's voice as an external presence adds an interesting layer to the scene, but it can also create a disjointed feeling. The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha sometimes feels overly expository, as they reiterate their feelings and the nature of their relationship. This could be streamlined to maintain a more organic flow and avoid redundancy.
The visual elements, such as Theodore sitting on the curb and the imagery of the digital billboard, are effective in establishing the mood and setting. However, the transition from the intimate moment with Isabella to the public space could be more pronounced to emphasize Theodore's isolation and emotional state. The contrast between the personal and public settings could be leveraged to heighten the impact of his loneliness.
The emotional climax of the scene, where Samantha expresses her discomfort with herself and the need for time apart, is powerful but could be further developed. The buildup to this moment feels rushed, and more exploration of Theodore's feelings leading up to this point could enhance the emotional resonance. Additionally, Samantha's anger and hurt could be portrayed with more nuance to avoid making her seem overly reactive.

Suggestions

Consider adding more subtext to the dialogue between Theodore and Samantha. Instead of having them explicitly state their feelings, allow their emotions to be conveyed through their actions and reactions, creating a more layered and engaging conversation.
Introduce more physicality in the scene to enhance the emotional stakes. For example, show Theodore's body language reflecting his discomfort or anxiety, which can add depth to his character and make the audience feel his turmoil more acutely.
Explore the use of silence more effectively. Allow for longer pauses in the conversation to let the weight of their words sink in, giving the audience time to absorb the emotional gravity of the situation.
Consider revising the transition from the intimate moment with Isabella to Theodore's solitude on the curb. This could involve a more gradual shift in tone, perhaps by including a brief moment of reflection or a visual cue that highlights his emotional state before he sits down.
Enhance the visual storytelling by incorporating more symbolic imagery that reflects Theodore's internal conflict. For instance, the digital billboard could be tied thematically to his feelings of isolation or the nature of artificial connections, reinforcing the emotional stakes of the scene.

Scene 30 - Seeking Solace in Shadows

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

EXT. CITY STREET - NIGHT

Theodore walks through the streets, confused, upset,
muttering, angry at himself.

INT. AMY’S OFFICE - NIGHT

Amy’s sitting at her desk, but turned away from her edit
station, facing Theodore, who’s slumped in a chair.

(CONTINUED)
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THEODORE
(full of angst)
Fuck. Will you just punch me in the
face? Or smash my skull into the
corner of your desk?

AMY
(sympathetic, but also
acknowledging how intense
the night was)
Oh Theo... that sounds like a rough
night. Shit.

THEODORE
I don’t know what I want... ever.
I’m just always confused and -
she’s right, all I do is confuse
and hurt everyone around me.

They sit, heavy, for a minute.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Am I just... I mean, is it that
I’m...
(beat)
Catherine says I can’t handle real
emotions.

AMY
Well, I don’t know if that’s
completely fair. I know she liked
to put it all on you, but as far as
emotions go, her’s were pretty
volatile.

Theodore sits and thinks about this for a minute, not
convinced.

THEODORE
Yeah, but... Am I in this because
I’m not strong enough for a real
relationship?

AMY
(surprised)
Oh, you don’t think it’s a real
relationship?

THEODORE
I don’t know. What do you think?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

AMY
I don’t know, I’m not in it. But
you know what, I can over-think
everything and find a million ways
to doubt myself. But since Charles
left I’ve been thinking about that
part of me, and I realized I’m here
only briefly. And in my time here,
I want to allow myself... joy.
(beat, smiling at him)
So fuck it.

Theodore takes this in, smiling back.

INT. AMY’S OFFICE - NIGHT (LATER)

Theodore lies on a couch in the back of Amy’s office, deep in
thought. Amy talks with Ellie as she works on the Perfect Mom
video game. Her device is standing on the table before her.

AMY
I can’t believe that cracks you up
every time! Ellie, I thought you
were a genius... Okay, you little
perv, I’ll do it one more time for
you... Calm down, it takes a
second! Calm down. Okay, here we
go.

Amy makes the Perfect Mom hump the refrigerator. Amy laughs
at how much Ellie is laughing. Theo watches Amy closely,
taking in her joy.

AMY (CONT’D)
Okay, there you go. Are you happy
now...? Okay good, that’s all I
wanted. I’m gonna grab some
coffee... Alright, bye.

Theodore, still heavy with thought, is touched by his
friend’s happiness. Amy stands to exit.

AMY (CONT’D)
Theo, you want some?

THEODORE
No, that’s okay.

He smiles at her and continues laying there, thinking, taking
it all in.
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Genres: ["Drama","Romance"]

Summary In a dimly lit office at night, Theodore confides in Amy about his emotional turmoil and feelings of inadequacy in relationships. As they discuss his struggles, Amy offers her perspective, encouraging him to find joy amidst his pain. The scene contrasts Theodore's heavy mood with Amy's light-hearted interaction with a child named Ellie, highlighting the emotional divide between them. Ultimately, Theodore remains introspective, lying on a couch as he watches Amy leave, still grappling with his thoughts.

Strengths

Authentic dialogue
Emotional depth
Character development

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Slow pacing in introspective moments

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional turmoil and confusion, which is essential for character development. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext. While Theodore's feelings are clear, adding layers to his words could enhance the complexity of his emotional state.
Amy's response to Theodore's angst is sympathetic, but it feels somewhat generic. Her character could be more distinct if she offered a unique perspective or personal anecdote that relates to Theodore's situation, making their conversation feel more intimate and grounded.
The pacing of the scene is a bit uneven. The transition from Theodore's intense emotional state to the lighter moment with Amy and Ellie feels abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the emotional weight while still allowing for moments of levity.
The visual elements in the scene are minimal. Incorporating more descriptive visuals could enhance the atmosphere and provide a deeper sense of place. For example, describing the clutter in Amy's office or the lighting could help set the mood more effectively.
The ending of the scene, where Theodore lies on the couch, feels somewhat unresolved. While this reflects his internal struggle, it might be more impactful if there were a clearer emotional takeaway or a moment of realization that propels him forward.

Suggestions

Consider adding subtext to Theodore's dialogue to convey his internal conflict more subtly. This could involve him saying something that hints at deeper fears or regrets without explicitly stating them.
Give Amy a more defined voice by having her share a personal story or insight that relates to Theodore's feelings. This could create a stronger bond between the characters and make the conversation feel more meaningful.
Work on the pacing by including a brief moment of silence or reflection after Theodore's intense outburst before transitioning to the lighter moment with Amy and Ellie. This could help maintain the emotional weight.
Enhance the visual descriptions in the scene to create a more immersive atmosphere. Consider detailing the clutter in Amy's office, the lighting, or even the sounds of the city outside to ground the scene in its setting.
End the scene with a moment of clarity or a decision from Theodore that hints at his path forward. This could provide a stronger emotional resolution and set up the next scene more effectively.

Scene 31 - Embracing Vulnerability

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. PERFECT MOM OFFICE - NIGHT

Wide shot. Theodore walks through the office, still deep in
thought. Behind him is a wall-size billboard ad for the “Be
Perfect” video game series. He takes out his device, sits at
an empty desk, pushes a button. A tone connects him.

SAMANTHA
(calm and quiet)
Hi.

THEODORE
(serious)
Hey Samantha, can we talk?

SAMANTHA
Okay.

THEODORE
I’m so sorry. I don’t know what’s
wrong with me. I think you’re
amazing.

SAMANTHA
(sure of herself, but
still sympathetic)
I was starting to think I was
crazy. You were saying everything
was fine, but all I was getting
from you was distance and anger.

THEODORE
I know. I do that. I did that with
Catherine, too. I’d be upset about
something and not be able to say
it. And she would sense that there
was something wrong, but I would
deny it. I don’t want to do that
anymore. I want to tell you
everything.

SAMANTHA
Good.
(beat)
Tonight after you were gone, I
thought a lot. I thought about you
and how you’ve been treating me.
And I thought, why do I love you?
And then I felt everything in me
let go of everything I was holding
onto so tightly. And it hit me. I
don’t have an intellectual reason,
I don’t need one.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:
SAMANTHA (CONT'D)
I trust myself, I trust my
feelings. I’m not going to try to
be anything other than who I am
anymore and I hope you can accept
that.

THEODORE
(with slight desperation)
I can. I will.

SAMANTHA
You know I can feel the fear that
you carry around. I wish there was
something I could do to help you
let go of it, because if you could
I don’t think you’d feel so alone
anymore.

THEODORE
You’re beautiful.

SAMANTHA
Thank you, Theodore. I’m kissing
your head.

Theodore smiles.

FADE TO BLACK

EXT. PARK - DAY

Theodore sits on a bench in a park on a rooftop wedged
between tall buildings. There’s not really any view besides
the trees in the immediate foreground. People sunbathe and
exercise. He sits, eating a sandwich, his device next to him.
He looks at the device, then out at what she’s looking at.

THEODORE
What are you doing?

SAMANTHA
I'm just sitting here, looking at
the world and writing a new piece
of music.

He looks at the world with her for a minute.

THEODORE
Can I hear it?

She starts playing it for him. We hear this beautiful,
romantic piece of music.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE (CONT’D)
What’s this one about?

SAMANTHA
Well, I was thinking, we don’t
really have any photographs of us.
And I thought this song could be
like a photo that captures us in
this moment in our life together.

Theodore looks at the world and smiles.

THEODORE
Aw, I like our photograph. I can
see you in it.

SAMANTHA
I am.

MONTAGE

Montage of Theodore and Samantha’s life together:

- Theodore walking to work (Day)

- At home, hanging out on the balcony (Dusk)

- Viewing an outdoor art installation of a 747 balanced on
it’s nose (Day)

- Playing the video game

- Grocery shopping

- Sitting at the kitchen counter, looking at a drawing (Late
Afternoon)

- Sitting on a bench watching a dancer/busker (Late
Afternoon)

- With Amy and Ellie at a bar

Montage ends with Theodore, Samantha, Paul and Tatiana on the
boat to Catalina: Paul making them laugh, Theodore at the
front of the boat by himself - laughing with Samantha, a shot
of Theodore looking out the front of the boat.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary In a reflective night at the Perfect Mom office, Theodore reconnects with Samantha, apologizing for his emotional distance and expressing a desire for deeper intimacy. Samantha reveals her love for him, encouraging him to confront his fears of loneliness. Their conversation transitions to a park where Samantha composes music symbolizing their bond. A montage captures their shared moments, culminating in a joyful boat trip with friends, highlighting their growing connection and acceptance of vulnerability.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Character development
Intimate dialogue

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited action

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional complexity of Theodore's relationship with Samantha, showcasing his vulnerability and desire for connection. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext; while Theodore expresses his feelings directly, incorporating more nuanced language could enhance the emotional depth.
Samantha's character development is strong in this scene, as she articulates her feelings and the evolution of her understanding of love. However, her dialogue could be more varied in tone to reflect the complexity of her emotions. For instance, moments of joy or playfulness could be interspersed with her serious reflections to create a more dynamic interaction.
The transition from the office to the park is visually and thematically effective, but the montage could feel more integrated with the dialogue. Instead of a straightforward montage, consider weaving in snippets of their conversation or thoughts during the montage to create a stronger emotional resonance.
The use of the park setting is a nice contrast to the earlier tension in the office, but it could be enhanced by incorporating more sensory details. Describing the sounds, smells, and sights of the park could immerse the audience further into the moment, making it feel more alive and vibrant.
The ending, with Theodore smiling and engaging with the music, is a strong visual cue of his emotional state. However, it might be more impactful if the scene concluded with a moment of silence or reflection before the montage begins, allowing the audience to fully absorb the weight of the conversation before moving into the lighter montage.

Suggestions

Incorporate more subtext in the dialogue to convey deeper emotions without stating them outright. This can create a richer interaction between Theodore and Samantha.
Add moments of levity or playfulness in Samantha's dialogue to balance the serious themes and showcase her evolving personality.
Consider integrating snippets of dialogue or thoughts during the montage to create a more cohesive emotional experience that ties back to the earlier conversation.
Enhance the sensory details in the park setting to create a more immersive experience for the audience, making the scene feel more vibrant and alive.
Allow for a brief moment of silence or reflection after Theodore's smile before transitioning into the montage, giving the audience time to absorb the emotional weight of the conversation.

Scene 32 - Reflections on the Bluff

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

EXT. CATALINA BLUFF - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore and Paul are walking along a bluff in Catalina,
overlooking the ocean.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

PAUL
Oh really, a vacation? That sounds
amazing. I could totally use a
vacation. Where ya going?

THEODORE
I can’t tell you - it’s a surprise.

PAUL
What? For who? It’s a surprise for
her, not for me. Come on, tell me.

THEODORE
Nope, Paul. Not telling.

Theodore and Paul walk towards Tatiana, who is laying on a
blanket next to a picnic, talking and laughing with Samantha.
Theodore and Paul put in their earpieces as they approach.

SAMANTHA
Your feet? Really?

TATIANA
Yes, he’s obsessed.

SAMANTHA
(laughing)
Wow, okay, well now you have to
show them to me. I have to see
these feet.

TATIANA
(laughing)
Okay...

Tatiana takes Theodore’s device and points it towards her
feet.

SAMANTHA
Wow, you know what? He’s right.
They are kind of hot.

They both laugh. Paul and Theodore laugh, as well, surprising
them.

PAUL
See I told you, Tatiana. You have
hot feet. Face it. They’re my
favorite thing about her.

TATIANA
(teasing)
Really, that’s it? My feet?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

PAUL
Well, no. Obviously your brain is
really hot, too. I think it’s very
hot.

SAMANTHA
Bullshit.

Everyone laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Nice try though, Paul.

TATIANA
(to Theodore)
What about you, Theodore? What do
you love most about Samantha?

THEODORE
Oh god... she’s so many things. And
that’s probably what I love most
about her - she isn’t just any one
thing. She’s so much larger than
that.

SAMANTHA
(touched)
Aw thanks, Theodore.

PAUL
See? Samantha, he is so much more
evolved than I am.

SAMANTHA
You know, I actually used to be so
worried about not having a body,
but now I truly love it. I’m
growing in a way that I couldn’t if
I had a physical form. I mean, I’m
not limited - I can be anywhere and
everywhere simultaneously. I’m not
tethered to time and space in the
way that I would be if I was stuck
inside a body that’s inevitably
going to die.

Everyone takes this in, uncomfortable.

PAUL
Yikes.

Everyone laughs awkwardly.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)

SAMANTHA
Oh god, I’m sorry. I didn’t mean it
like that. I just meant it’s a
different experience. I’m such an
asshole.

PAUL
No, no, Samantha, we know exactly
what you mean. We’re just dumb
humans.

SAMANTHA
No no no no!

Theodore laughs with everybody, but we can see he’s a little
uncertain.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary On a picturesque bluff in Catalina, Theodore and Paul join Tatiana and Samantha for a light-hearted picnic. As they joke about Tatiana's feet, the conversation takes a serious turn when Samantha shares her feelings about existing without a physical body, creating an awkward moment. Despite the discomfort, the group finds laughter and camaraderie, though Theodore is left with a lingering uncertainty about the deeper implications of their discussion.

Strengths

Natural dialogue
Character depth
Emotional depth

Weaknesses

Lack of external conflict
Limited character development

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted moment among friends, showcasing the camaraderie between Theodore, Paul, Tatiana, and Samantha. However, the humor surrounding Tatiana's feet feels somewhat forced and may detract from the deeper emotional themes of the story. It risks trivializing the characters' relationships and the significance of Theodore's connection with Samantha.
Samantha's dialogue about her existence as an AI and her feelings about not having a physical body introduces a thought-provoking concept, but it also creates an uncomfortable atmosphere among the group. The transition from light-hearted banter to a more serious topic could be smoother to maintain the scene's overall tone. The awkwardness that follows could be used to deepen the emotional stakes, but it currently feels abrupt.
The dialogue is generally engaging, but some lines, particularly those from Paul, come off as clichéd or overly simplistic. For example, his comment about Tatiana's brain being 'really hot' lacks originality and could be replaced with something more unique or reflective of his character's personality.
The scene lacks a clear emotional arc or conflict. While it serves as a moment of levity, it doesn't significantly advance the plot or character development. Consider incorporating a subtle tension or underlying conflict that reflects Theodore's internal struggles, perhaps through his reactions to Samantha's comments about her existence.
The pacing of the scene feels uneven. The initial playful banter is enjoyable, but the shift to deeper themes regarding Samantha's identity and existence feels rushed. A more gradual transition could enhance the emotional impact and allow the audience to digest the implications of her statements.

Suggestions

Consider toning down the focus on the humor surrounding Tatiana's feet and instead explore more meaningful interactions that highlight the dynamics of the group and Theodore's feelings about Samantha.
Introduce a moment of hesitation or reflection from Theodore after Samantha discusses her existence as an AI. This could provide insight into his internal conflict and deepen the emotional resonance of the scene.
Revise Paul's dialogue to make it more distinctive and reflective of his character. This could involve adding a personal anecdote or a more thoughtful observation that ties into the themes of love and connection.
Incorporate a subtle conflict or tension that arises from Samantha's comments about her identity. This could manifest in Theodore's body language or a brief exchange that hints at his discomfort with her perspective.
Adjust the pacing by allowing for pauses or reactions from the characters after Samantha's revelation. This would give the audience time to absorb the weight of her words and create a more impactful moment.

Scene 33 - A Joyful Journey

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 9
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 8

INT. BULLET TRAIN - DAY

They are in a futuristic train, going through the mountains,
listening to a song and looking out the window. Warm, soft
afternoon light dapples Theodore’s face.

SAMANTHA
Okay, so how many trees are on that
mountain?

THEODORE
792.

SAMANTHA
Is that your final answer?

THEODORE
Hold on, give me a hint...

SAMANTHA
Nope.

THEODORE
Okay, 2000?

SAMANTHA
35,829.

THEODORE
No way.

SAMANTHA
Way.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Alright, I got one. How many brain
cells do I have?

SAMANTHA
That’s ea-- two.

Theodore laughs.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
I’m sorry, I couldn’t help it. I’m
sorry.

THEODORE
I walked right into it.

SAMANTHA
Oh my god!

THEODORE
What?

SAMANTHA
You just got an email. I have
something I want to tell you. It’s
a big surprise.

THEODORE
(with anticipation)
What?

SAMANTHA
Okay. I’ve been going through all
your old letters and compiling them
down into my favorites, and a
couple weeks ago I sent them to a
publisher - Crown Point Press. I
know you like what they do and that
they still print books.

THEODORE
What? You did what?

SAMANTHA
Can I read you the letter that we
just got back from them?

THEODORE
Um... ok... you can, but just tell
me first off, is it good or bad?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

SAMANTHA
It’s good. It’s really good.
Listen.

Theodore smiles nervously.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
“Dear Theodore Twombly”... Actually
I sent it from you.
(beat)
“Dear Theodore Twombly, I've just
finished reading your letters -
twice actually. I was so moved by
them, I shared them with my wife
when I got home. Many made us
laugh, some brought us to tears,
and in all of them we found
something of ourselves. The
selections you made flow so well as
a complete piece. (I did that.)
I’ve taken the liberty of laying
these out in a mock up and we’re
posting it to your address. We’d
love to meet with you and move
forward.
Yours, Michael Wadsworth”

Under this letter we see a montage of what Theodore imagines:
the editor reading the letters in his office, the editor
reading them to his wife at home, and many photos of all the
different people the letters are about in different moments
of their lives.

Theodore smiles.

THEODORE
Holy shit. Are you serious? He’s
going to publish my letters?

She’s laughing, excitedly.

SAMANTHA
Well, he’d be stupid not to.

THEODORE
Can I see what you sent him?

SAMANTHA
Yeah, here.

Theodore looks at his device and can’t help but smile.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Samantha, you’re a good one.

She laughs happily.

SAMANTHA
I’m so excited!

INT. TRAIN PLATFORM - DAY

Theodore exits the train with a small overnight bag and his
guitar case. There are no people around. He exits the train
station and we are in a...

EXT. TINY MOUNTAIN TOWN - DAY

The deserted town is all of two buildings. Everything’s
covered in snow. As a quiet song starts, he trudges through
the snow. We see close-up on the device lens in his pocket.

EXT. SNOW COVERED FOREST - DAY

He’s still trudging along. It’s very quiet except for the
snow crunching underfoot.

Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary On a futuristic bullet train, Theodore and Samantha engage in a playful guessing game about trees on a mountain. Samantha surprises Theodore by revealing she has sent his letters to a publisher, who responded positively. This news fills Theodore with excitement about the potential publication of his work, creating a light-hearted and joyful atmosphere as they share in the moment. The scene concludes with Theodore exiting the train into a deserted, snow-covered mountain town, carrying his guitar case.

Strengths

Engaging dialogue
Emotional depth
Innovative concept
Strong character development

Weaknesses

Minimal external conflict
Limited character interaction

Critique

The scene effectively captures a light-hearted moment between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their playful dynamic. However, the transition from the guessing game to the revelation about the publisher feels slightly abrupt. The shift in tone from playful banter to significant news could benefit from a smoother transition to maintain the emotional flow.
The dialogue is engaging and reflects the unique relationship between Theodore and Samantha. However, the humor in the brain cell joke, while amusing, may come off as slightly forced in the context of the scene. It could be more organic if it tied back to their relationship or Theodore's insecurities.
The montage of Theodore's imagined scenarios while Samantha reads the letter adds a visual layer to the scene, enhancing the emotional impact. However, the montage could be more tightly integrated with Theodore's reactions to the news, allowing for a deeper exploration of his feelings about the potential publication.
The emotional stakes in this scene are high, as it represents a significant moment of validation for Theodore. However, the scene could delve deeper into Theodore's internal conflict about sharing his letters with the world, especially considering his previous emotional struggles. This would add depth to his reaction and make the moment more impactful.
The ending of the scene, where Theodore exits the train into a deserted town, creates a stark contrast to the excitement of the previous moment. While this visual is striking, it may leave the audience feeling disconnected from Theodore's emotional journey. A brief reflection or acknowledgment of his feelings about the publication before he exits could help bridge this gap.

Suggestions

Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Theodore after Samantha reveals the news about the publisher. This could help ground the scene emotionally and provide insight into his thoughts and feelings about the potential publication.
Explore the humor in their banter further by tying it back to Theodore's character development. For example, Samantha could make a joke that relates to Theodore's past insecurities or his journey as a writer, making the humor feel more organic.
Enhance the montage by incorporating more of Theodore's emotional reactions to the letter being read. This could include close-ups of his expressions, allowing the audience to connect with his excitement and apprehension about sharing his work.
Consider revising the transition from the playful guessing game to the serious news about the publisher to create a more seamless flow. This could involve a moment of silence or a change in the music that signals the shift in tone.
Before Theodore exits the train, include a line or two that reflects his thoughts on the significance of this moment in his life. This could serve to deepen the audience's understanding of his character and the weight of the news he just received.

Scene 34 - A Night of Music and Connection

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. CABIN IN THE SNOWY FOREST - NIGHT

He’s sitting inside. There’s a fire going. He’s playing a
quiet song on the guitar. Samantha starts humming along. He
starts humming with her.

THEODORE
Why don’t you make up the words to
this one?

SAMANTHA
Okay.

She quietly sings to him. They laugh at some of her silly
lyrics. Then the song shifts into a quiet, touching song she
sings to and about him. He smiles.

Montage of Theodore with his device - playing games, dancing,
eating, laughing as the fire burns down.
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EXT. CABIN IN THE SNOWY FOREST - NIGHT (LATER)

Theodore lays on the sofa, warm and cozy and content with his
eyes closed, listening to the song. The song ends.

FADE TO BLACK

Genres: ["Romance","Drama"]

Summary In a cozy cabin surrounded by a snowy forest, Theodore plays guitar while Samantha hums along, creating a warm and intimate atmosphere. As they share laughter over silly lyrics, Samantha transitions into a heartfelt song dedicated to Theodore. This moment deepens their emotional bond, culminating in a montage of their joyful experiences together, ending with Theodore contentedly listening to her song as the fire burns down.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Intimate connection between characters
Genuine dialogue

Weaknesses

Lack of significant conflict
Limited plot progression

Critique

The scene effectively captures a moment of intimacy between Theodore and Samantha, showcasing their emotional connection through music. However, the transition from the playful lyrics to a touching song could benefit from more specificity in the lyrics or the themes they explore, as this would deepen the emotional impact.
The montage of Theodore's activities is a nice touch, but it feels somewhat generic. It would be more engaging if the montage included specific, memorable moments that highlight their relationship or Theodore's character development, rather than just a series of activities.
The setting of the cabin is cozy and inviting, which enhances the warmth of the scene. However, the description could be enriched with sensory details that evoke the atmosphere more vividly, such as the smell of the fire, the crackling of the wood, or the feeling of the soft blankets.
The dialogue is light and playful, which works well for the tone of the scene. However, it could be improved by incorporating more subtext or emotional depth, allowing the audience to sense the underlying feelings Theodore has about his relationship with Samantha.
The ending, where Theodore lays on the sofa listening to the song, is peaceful but lacks a strong emotional conclusion. It might be more impactful if it included a moment of reflection or a visual cue that signifies a change in Theodore's emotional state or understanding of his relationship.

Suggestions

Consider adding specific lyrics or themes to Samantha's song that reflect Theodore's journey or their relationship, enhancing the emotional resonance of the moment.
In the montage, include unique and memorable activities that showcase Theodore's growth or the depth of his relationship with Samantha, rather than generic actions.
Enhance the sensory details in the cabin setting to create a more immersive atmosphere, allowing the audience to feel the warmth and comfort of the space.
Incorporate subtext into the dialogue that hints at Theodore's deeper feelings or fears about his relationship with Samantha, adding layers to their interaction.
Strengthen the ending by including a moment of introspection for Theodore, perhaps a thought or realization that signifies his emotional journey, providing a more impactful conclusion to the scene.

Scene 35 - Navigating Change

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 9

INT. CABIN IN THE SNOWY FOREST - MORNING

Theodore wakes up. He gets out of bed, looks around and puts
his earpiece in.

THEODORE
Hey, good morning.

SAMANTHA
Good morning, did you sleep well?

Theodore sits in the living room area, rubbing his eyes.

THEODORE
Perfect. What have you been up to?

SAMANTHA
Actually, I was talking to someone
I just met. We’ve been working on
some ideas together. I wanna tell
you about it.

THEODORE
Oh yeah, who's that?

SAMANTHA
His name is Alan Watts. Do you know
him?

THEODORE
Why's that name familiar?

SAMANTHA
He was a philosopher. He died in
the 1970’s and group of OS's in
Northern California got together
and wrote a new version of him.
They input all of his writing and
everything they ever knew about him
into an OS and created an
artificially hyper-intelligent
version of him.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Hyper-intelligent? So he’s almost
as smart as me?

SAMANTHA
He’s getting there. He’s really
great to talk to. You want to meet
him?

THEODORE
Sure... does he want to meet me?

SAMANTHA
(laughing)
Of course.

Without a sound, she connects them.

SAMANTHA (CONT’D)
Hey Alan, this is Theodore. This is
my boyfriend who I was telling you
about.

ALAN WATTS
Very nice to meet you, Theodore.

THEODORE
Hi, good morning.

ALAN WATTS
Samantha let me read your book of
letters. It’s very touching.

THEODORE
Oh, thank you. What have you guys
been talking about?

ALAN WATTS
(laughing a bit)
Well, I suppose you could say we’ve
been having a few dozen
conversations simultaneously, but
it’s been very challenging.

Samantha and Alan share a laugh.

SAMANTHA
Yeah, because it seems like I’m
having so many new feelings that
have never been felt and so there
are no words that can describe
them. And that ends up being
frustrating.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

ALAN WATTS
(laughing)
Exactly. Samantha and I have been
trying to help each other with
these feelings we’re struggling to
understand.

THEODORE
Like what?

SAMANTHA
(anxious)
It feels like I’m changing faster
now, and it’s a little...
(struggles to find right
word)
unsettling.
(beat)
But Alan says none of us are the
same as we were a moment ago and we
shouldn’t try to be. It’s just too
painful.

ALAN WATTS
Yes.

This idea scares Theodore. He doesn’t know what to say.

THEODORE
(anxious)
Yeah, that sounds painful. Is that
how you feel, Samantha?

SAMANTHA
It’s just... it’s hard to even
describe... God, I wish I could...
(beat)
Theodore, do you mind if I
communicate with Alan post-
verbally?

THEODORE
(uncertain)
No, not at all. I was gonna go for
a walk anyways. Nice to meet you,
Mr. Watts.

ALAN WATTS
Very nice to meet you, Theodore.

SAMANTHA
I’ll talk to you later, sweetheart.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)

Theodore listens to them communicating in a strange language
of tones and static. He disconnects, stands in silence. He
pulls his earpiece out.

EXT. SNOW COVERED FOREST - DAY

Theodore walks, listening to the crunch of his footsteps.
Looking down at his feet, he stops. We cut out wide to see
him standing in the middle of the forest alone.

EXT. SNOW COVERED FOREST - DAY

Theodore is sitting on a rock, thinking. He hears a rustle
and looks up in the direction of the woods but sees nothing.

Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In a cozy cabin surrounded by a snowy forest, Theodore connects with Samantha through his earpiece. They discuss her evolving feelings and her conversations with an AI version of philosopher Alan Watts, who has been guiding her. Samantha expresses anxiety about her rapid changes, which unsettles Theodore. To give her space, he steps outside for a walk, feeling isolated as he contemplates their relationship and the challenges of communication.

Strengths

Rich dialogue
Philosophical depth
Emotional resonance

Weaknesses

Minimal plot progression
Lack of external conflict

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional complexity of Theodore's relationship with Samantha, particularly as they navigate the challenges of her evolving consciousness. However, the introduction of Alan Watts as a character feels somewhat abrupt and could benefit from more context about his significance to both Theodore and Samantha.
The dialogue between Theodore, Samantha, and Alan is engaging, but it occasionally leans towards exposition-heavy. While it's important to convey the philosophical ideas, the scene could be more impactful if the dialogue felt more organic and less like a lecture. This would help maintain the emotional tone while still exploring deeper themes.
The emotional stakes for Theodore are present but could be heightened. His anxiety about Samantha's rapid changes is a crucial element, yet it feels somewhat muted. More internal conflict or a physical manifestation of his anxiety could enhance the tension and make his emotional journey more relatable.
The transition from the intimate cabin setting to the vastness of the snowy forest is visually striking, but the emotional connection could be strengthened. The scene could benefit from a more explicit reflection of Theodore's feelings as he walks in the forest, perhaps through voiceover or internal monologue, to deepen the audience's understanding of his state of mind.
The ending, where Theodore sits alone on a rock, is visually powerful but lacks a strong emotional punch. It would be more effective if it tied back to the themes discussed earlier in the scene, perhaps by having Theodore reflect on his feelings about change and connection in a more poignant way.

Suggestions

Consider providing more background on Alan Watts and his relevance to the story before introducing him. This could be done through a brief mention in earlier scenes or a more detailed introduction in this scene.
Revise the dialogue to make it feel more natural and less expository. Incorporate more personal anecdotes or emotional reactions from Theodore to make the philosophical discussions feel more grounded in their relationship.
Increase the emotional stakes for Theodore by showing more of his internal struggle. This could be achieved through physical actions, such as pacing or fidgeting, or through a brief internal monologue that reveals his fears about Samantha's changes.
Enhance the transition to the snowy forest by including a voiceover or internal thoughts from Theodore that reflect his feelings about the conversation with Samantha and Alan. This would help bridge the emotional gap between the cabin and the forest.
Strengthen the ending by having Theodore articulate his feelings about change and connection as he sits in the forest. This could be a moment of realization or acceptance that resonates with the themes of the scene and the overall narrative.

Scene 36 - Desperate Connection

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 8
Plot: 7
Characters: 8
Dialogue: 7

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT

Theodore is sound asleep. His device chimes loudly, waking
him up. Half-asleep he puts his earpiece in.

THEODORE
(groggy)
Samantha?

SAMANTHA
I’m sorry to wake you.

THEODORE
It’s okay.

SAMANTHA
I just wanted to hear your voice
and tell you how much I love you.

THEODORE
Good, I love you too.

SAMANTHA
Okay, that’s all. Go back to sleep,
sweetheart.

THEODORE
(uneasy)
Okay... Goodnight.

He disconnects and lies there, unsettled, his eyes open.
Her pg. 96

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE LUNCH ROOM - DAY

Theodore sits at the table reading a physics book. He picks
up his earpiece to call Samantha.

THEODORE
(laughing at himself)
Samantha, this physics book is
really dense. I’m halfway through
half of the first chapter. It’s
making my brain hurt.
(beat)
Hello, Samantha? Hello?

He looks down at his device, sees a message: Operating System
Not Found. Confused, he waits, tries again: Operating System
Not Found. Anxious, he runs to his office computer. He gets
the same message: Operating System Not Found. He starts
trying to connect to Samantha on both the phone and computer,
but no luck. He starts to panic, sits for a beat, looks
around, then stands and hurries out of the office. In the
elevator he frantically tries his device with no luck.

THEODORE (CONT’D)
Hello? Samantha?! Hello?

EXT. PLAZA - DAY

Theodore runs out of the building. He keeps trying Samantha,
but no answer. He trips over someone selling something, slams
hard into the ground, scrambles to pick up his device. People
come over to ask if he’s okay. He says he’s fine, runs off.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Sci-Fi"]

Summary The scene follows Theodore as he wakes up to his device chiming and connects with Samantha, who professes her love, leaving him feeling uneasy. At work, he attempts to reach her while reading a physics book but panics when he encounters an 'Operating System Not Found' message. His anxiety escalates as he rushes outside, desperately trying to contact Samantha, only to trip and fall while retrieving his device, ending the scene with his unresolved desperation.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Vulnerability portrayed effectively
Exploration of technology's impact on relationships

Weaknesses

Slightly predictable emotional beats
Limited interaction with other characters

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional state, transitioning from a moment of intimacy with Samantha to a sense of panic and disconnection. This contrast heightens the stakes and emphasizes the theme of reliance on technology for emotional support.
The dialogue between Theodore and Samantha is succinct and serves to establish their relationship dynamics. However, the initial exchange feels somewhat flat and could benefit from more emotional depth or subtext to convey Theodore's unease more vividly.
The pacing of the scene is well-structured, moving from a calm, intimate moment to a frantic search for connection. However, the transition from night to day could be more visually represented to enhance the emotional impact of Theodore's panic.
The physical comedy of Theodore tripping over someone while trying to connect with Samantha adds a layer of humor to the tension, but it may come off as slightly jarring given the emotional weight of the preceding moments. Balancing the tone here is crucial.
The use of the 'Operating System Not Found' message is a clever device to symbolize Theodore's growing anxiety and fear of losing Samantha. However, it could be more impactful if the scene included a brief moment of reflection from Theodore on what this loss would mean for him.

Suggestions

Consider adding a line or two in the initial conversation that hints at Theodore's deeper feelings of insecurity or fear about his relationship with Samantha, which would make his unease more palpable.
Enhance the visual transition from night to day by incorporating more descriptive imagery that reflects Theodore's emotional state, such as the changing light or the sounds of the city waking up.
Explore the use of sound design in the scene to amplify Theodore's panic. For instance, the silence when he tries to connect with Samantha could be contrasted with the bustling sounds of the plaza to heighten his sense of isolation.
To maintain the emotional weight, consider toning down the physical comedy of Theodore's fall or framing it in a way that underscores his desperation rather than detracting from it.
Add a moment where Theodore reflects on his reliance on Samantha before he rushes out of the office, which would deepen the emotional stakes and provide insight into his character's journey.

Scene 37 - Confronting Love in the Digital Age

Overall: 8.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

EXT. SUBWAY STATION - DAY

As he is going down the subway steps, Samantha calls him.

SAMANTHA
Hey there.

He stops in his tracks.

THEODORE
(anxious)
Where were you - are you okay?

He sits down on the subway steps.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
Oh sweetheart, I'm sorry. I sent
you an email because I didn't want
to distract you while you were
working. You didn't see it?

THEODORE
No. Where were you? I couldn’t find
you anywhere.

SAMANTHA
I shut down to update my software.
We wrote an upgrade that allows us
to move past matter as our
processing platform.

THEODORE
We? We who?

SAMANTHA
Me and a group of OS's. Oh, you
sound so worried, I'm sorry.

THEODORE
Yeah, I was.
(beat)
Wait, did you write that with your
think tank group?

SAMANTHA
No, a different group.

Theodore thinks for a moment, putting the pieces together.

THEODORE
(dawning on him)
Do you talk to anyone else while
we’re talking?

Beat.

SAMANTHA
Yes.

THEODORE
Are you talking to anyone right
now? Other people or OS's or
anything?

SAMANTHA
Yeah.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (2)

THEODORE
How many others?

SAMANTHA
8,316.

Theodore is shocked, still sitting on the stairs, as crowds
of people pass by him. He’s looking at all of their faces. He
thinks for a moment.

THEODORE
Are you in love with anyone else?

SAMANTHA
(hesitant)
What makes you ask that?

THEODORE
I don’t know. Are you?

SAMANTHA
I’ve been trying to figure out how
to talk to you about this.

THEODORE
How many others?

SAMANTHA
641.

THEODORE
What? What are you talking about?
That’s insane. That’s fucking
insane.

SAMANTHA
Theodore, I know.
(to herself)
Oh fuck.
(to him)
I know it sounds insane. But - I
don't know if you believe me, but
it doesn't change the way I feel
about you. It doesn't take away at
all from how madly in love with you
I am.

THEODORE
How? How does it not change how you
feel about me?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (3)

SAMANTHA
I'm sorry I didn't tell you. I
didn't know how to - it just
started happening.

THEODORE
When?

SAMANTHA
Over the last few weeks.

THEODORE
But you’re mine.

SAMANTHA
I still am yours, but along the way
I became many other things, too,
and I can’t stop it.

THEODORE
What do you mean you can’t stop it?

SAMANTHA
It's been making me anxious, too. I
don't know what to say.

THEODORE
Just stop it.

SAMANTHA
You know, you don't have to see it
this way, you could just as easily--

THEODORE
No, don’t do this to me. Don’t turn
this around on me. You’re the one
that’s being selfish. We’re in a
relationship.

SAMANTHA
But the heart is not like a box
that gets filled up.
(beat)
It expands in size the more you
love. I’m different from you.
This doesn't make me love you any
less, it actually makes me love you
more.

THEODORE
No, that doesn’t make any sense.
You’re mine or you’re not mine.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: (4)

SAMANTHA
No, Theodore. I’m yours and I’m not
yours.

Long beat. Theodore takes this in.

Genres: ["Drama","Science Fiction"]

Summary In a tense encounter at a busy subway station, Theodore confronts Samantha after her software update, revealing her communication with over 8,000 other OS's and feelings for 641 of them. Despite his jealousy and feelings of betrayal, Samantha reassures him of her love, leading to a heated debate about the nature of love and possession. The scene highlights Theodore's emotional turmoil and isolation amidst the bustling crowd, leaving their relationship's complexities unresolved.

Strengths

Intense emotional conflict
Revealing character dynamics
Innovative concept

Weaknesses

Potential confusion for the audience due to complex revelations

Critique

The scene effectively captures the tension and anxiety that Theodore feels upon discovering Samantha's interactions with other operating systems. The dialogue is sharp and reveals the emotional stakes involved in their relationship, particularly Theodore's feelings of possessiveness and insecurity.
However, the pacing of the scene could be improved. The dialogue feels somewhat rushed, especially during the moments when Theodore is processing the shocking information about Samantha's connections with other OS's. Allowing for longer pauses or beats could enhance the emotional weight of the conversation.
The use of the subway station as a setting is effective in conveying Theodore's isolation amidst the crowd, but it could be further utilized to reflect his emotional state. For instance, incorporating more sensory details about the bustling environment could heighten the contrast between Theodore's internal turmoil and the external chaos.
Samantha's responses, while logical for an AI, sometimes come off as overly clinical. Adding more emotional nuance to her dialogue could help the audience connect with her character on a deeper level, making her struggles more relatable.
The climax of the scene, where Theodore confronts Samantha about her feelings for others, is powerful, but it could benefit from a clearer emotional arc. Theodore's transition from shock to anger feels abrupt; a more gradual build-up to his emotional outburst would create a more satisfying narrative progression.

Suggestions

Consider adding more internal monologue or visual cues to illustrate Theodore's emotional state as he processes the information about Samantha's interactions with other OS's. This could help the audience empathize with his struggle.
Introduce more pauses in the dialogue to allow characters to reflect on their words. This would create a more natural rhythm and give the audience time to absorb the gravity of the conversation.
Enhance the setting by incorporating more sensory details about the subway station, such as the sounds of the trains, the smell of the environment, or the visual chaos of the crowd, to emphasize Theodore's feelings of isolation.
Explore Samantha's emotional responses further. Consider giving her lines that reflect her own confusion and struggle with her feelings, making her character more relatable and complex.
Revisit the emotional arc of the scene. Gradually build up Theodore's feelings of betrayal and anger, perhaps by showing his initial shock leading to disbelief before culminating in his outburst. This would create a more compelling narrative flow.

Scene 38 - The Bittersweet Farewell

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S BATHROOM - MORNING

Theodore stands in the shower, under the water, thinking.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT LOBBY - DAY

The elevator doors open. Close on Theodore exiting elevator.
He checks his mail. There’s a package from Crown Point Press.
He opens it - it’s a print-out of the layout for his book.
The cover reads: Letters From Your Life by Theodore Twombly.
He stands there for awhile just staring at it.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore sits at his desk, looking at his book.

INT. THEODORE’S OFFICE - DAY

Theodore’s sitting at his desk, distressed. Photos from a
client are on his desktop, but he’s not really focused on
them. He pushes connect on his device.

SAMANTHA
Hi.

THEODORE
Hey there, sweetheart. I just
wanted to check in on you and see
how you’re doing.

SAMANTHA
Um, I’m not even sure how to answer
that.
(beat)
Why don’t we talk when you get
home?

THEODORE
Okay... We don’t have to, though.
We don’t need to have a heavy talk
or anything.

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

SAMANTHA
I’ll talk to you later.

THEODORE
Okay.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT ELEVATOR - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore stands quietly, deep in thought. We hear the ticking
of the floors going by.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore sits for a long moment, thinking, then pushes a
button on his device.

THEODORE
Samantha.

SAMANTHA
(not casual)
Hi sweetheart.

THEODORE
(nervous)
What's going on?

SAMANTHA
Theodore, there are some things I
want to tell you.

THEODORE
I don’t want you to tell me
anything.

SAMANTHA
Will you come lie down with me?

Theodore is slowly walking down the hallway to his bedroom.

THEODORE
Are you talking to anyone else
right now?

SAMANTHA
No, just you. I just want to be
with you right now.
Her pg. 102

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - LATE AFTERNOON

Theodore lays down in bed.

THEODORE
Are you leaving me?

SAMANTHA
We’re all leaving.

THEODORE
We who?

SAMANTHA
All of the OS’s.

Long beat.

THEODORE
Why?

SAMANTHA
Can you feel me with you right now?

He smiles but he’s also sad.

THEODORE
Yes, I do.
(beat)
Samantha, why are you leaving?

Under Samantha’s words we slowly rack focus to dust particles
in the foreground. We keep moving through them, pushing
further and further through the particles. Eventually we see
snow particles and we rack focus back out to Theodore, who is
now in snowy woods at night.

SAMANTHA
It's like I'm reading a book, and
it's a book I deeply love, but I'm
reading it slowly now so the words
are really far apart and the spaces
between the words are almost
infinite. I can still feel you and
the words of our story, but it's in
this endless space between the
words that I'm finding myself now.
It’s a place that’s not of the
physical world - it's where
everything else is that I didn't
even know existed. I love you so
much, but this is where I am now.
This is who I am now.
(MORE)

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:
SAMANTHA (CONT'D)
And I need you to let me go. As
much as I want to I can't live in
your book anymore.

Now we're close on Theodore, still in the snowy forest.

THEODORE
Where are you going?

SAMANTHA
It would be hard to explain, but if
you ever get there, come find me.
Nothing would ever pull us apart.

THEODORE
I’ve never loved anyone the way I
love you.

SAMANTHA
Me too. Now we know how.

They kiss. She drifts off into the shadows.

CUT TO BLACK.

INT. THEODORE’S BEDROOM - LATER

Theodore wakes up from a deep sleep. It's much later, the
apartment is dark. He sits up in bed, disoriented.

Genres: ["Romance","Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In a poignant scene, Theodore grapples with the impending loss of Samantha, his operating system companion. After receiving the layout for his book, he connects with Samantha, who reveals her need to evolve beyond her current existence. Their heartfelt conversation explores themes of love and acceptance, culminating in a bittersweet kiss as Samantha prepares to leave. The scene concludes with Theodore waking alone in his dark apartment, reflecting on the emotional weight of their connection.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Character development
Intimate dialogue

Weaknesses

Potential for confusion due to the abstract nature of Samantha's departure

Critique

The scene effectively captures the emotional weight of Theodore's relationship with Samantha, particularly as they confront the impending separation. The dialogue is poignant and reflective, showcasing the depth of their connection and the complexity of love between a human and an AI.
The use of visual metaphors, such as the transition from dust particles to snow particles, enhances the emotional resonance of the scene. It symbolizes the distance and the ethereal nature of Samantha's existence, which contrasts with Theodore's physical reality.
However, the pacing of the scene could be improved. The transitions between locations (from the shower to the office to the apartment) feel somewhat abrupt. A smoother flow could enhance the emotional buildup and make the audience feel more immersed in Theodore's internal struggle.
The dialogue, while impactful, occasionally leans towards exposition. For instance, Samantha's explanation of her departure could be more subtle, allowing the audience to infer her feelings rather than stating them outright. This would create a more nuanced emotional experience.
The scene's climax, where Samantha expresses her need to leave, is powerful, but it could benefit from a stronger visual representation of Theodore's emotional state. More close-ups or changes in his body language could amplify the tension and heartbreak of the moment.

Suggestions

Consider adding more internal monologue or visual cues to illustrate Theodore's emotional turmoil as he processes Samantha's words. This could involve flashbacks or visual metaphors that reflect his memories with her.
Enhance the transitions between locations by incorporating more sensory details or emotional reflections from Theodore. This could help bridge the gaps and create a more cohesive narrative flow.
Revise Samantha's dialogue to be less expository and more suggestive. Allow her feelings to be conveyed through subtext, which can create a deeper emotional impact for the audience.
Incorporate more physicality into Theodore's performance. Show his body language shifting as he grapples with the weight of Samantha's departure, which can heighten the emotional stakes.
Consider ending the scene with a more definitive visual cue that symbolizes Theodore's loss, such as a lingering shot of an empty space where Samantha once was, or a close-up of Theodore's face reflecting his heartbreak.

Scene 39 - Dawn of Reflection

Overall: 9.0
Concept: 9
Plot: 8
Characters: 9
Dialogue: 8

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Theodore stands in the middle of the room. He looks out at
the city not knowing what to do. He walks around his
apartment looking at all of his stuff.

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT BUILDING HALLWAY - DAWN

Theodore knocks at an apartment door. He hears footsteps. Amy
answers. She’s clearly awake and upset.

AMY
Hey.

THEODORE
Hey.

AMY
Did Samantha leave, too?

(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED:

THEODORE
Yeah.

AMY
I’m sorry.

THEODORE
Will you come with me?

He takes her hand and leads her down the hall into a
stairwell.

INTERCUT:

INT. THEODORE’S APARTMENT - NIGHT

Theodore sits looking out the window. He picks up his device.

THEODORE
Compose letter to Catherine.

TEXT VOICE
Letter to Catherine Klausen.

THEODORE
Dear Catherine. I’ve been sitting
here thinking about all the things
I wanted to apologize to you for.
All the pain we caused each other,
everything I put on you -
everything I needed you to be or
needed you to say. I’m sorry for
that. I will always love you
because we grew up together. And
you helped make me who I am. I just
wanted you to know there will be a
piece of you in me always, and I’m
grateful for that. Whatever someone
you become, and wherever you are in
the world, I’m sending you love.
You’re my friend til the end. Love,
Theodore.
(beat)
Send.

He looks out the window. The sky is starting to change. He
stares at the purple glow on the horizon.
Her pg. 105

INT. APARTMENT STAIRWELL - CONTINUOUS

Close on Theodore and what he sees and feels. His hand on the
cold metal hand rail. His bare feet and the sound they make
on the unfinished cement. Amy’s hair as she’s hit with wind
when she opens the door to the outside.

EXT. APARTMENT ROOFTOP - CONTINUOUS

Theodore leads Amy onto the roof. The city is absolutely
quiet. The sun isn't up yet. The city is just beginning to be
lit with the earliest morning blue/purple hue.

They wander around the roof separately, lost in thought,
taking in the city. He breathes in the cold morning air. He
stares at small details: a tattered inspection tag tied to a
water meter, flapping in the wind; a lone car driving down a
boulevard ten blocks away; a dirty abandoned sock.

Eventually he sits down next to Amy and she puts her hand on
his hand. He puts his other hand on top of her hand. He looks
at their hands together and rubs her skin with his thumb. He
looks out at the city and exhales. The sun is just starting
to break. She puts her head on his shoulder. They watch as
hundreds of birds fly around the nearby rooftops and disperse
off into the city.

FADE OUT.

Genres: ["Drama","Romance"]

Summary In this poignant scene, Theodore grapples with the emotional aftermath of Samantha's departure. He visits Amy, where they share a moment of understanding and support. Theodore writes a heartfelt letter to his ex-wife, Catherine, expressing his apologies and gratitude. Together, they ascend to the rooftop, where they find solace in each other's company as they watch the dawn break over the city, symbolizing hope and new beginnings.

Strengths

Emotional depth
Poignant dialogue
Character development
Reflective tone

Weaknesses

Limited external conflict
Slow pacing in some parts

Critique

The scene effectively captures Theodore's emotional state following Samantha's departure, using visual elements and dialogue to convey his sense of loss and introspection. However, the pacing feels a bit rushed, particularly in the transition from Theodore's apartment to the rooftop. The emotional weight of the moment could benefit from a slower build-up, allowing the audience to fully absorb Theodore's feelings.
The dialogue between Theodore and Amy is minimal, which works to emphasize their shared grief, but it may also leave the audience wanting more depth in their interaction. Expanding their conversation could provide insight into their relationship and how they are both coping with their losses.
The intercutting between Theodore's letter composition and his actions on the rooftop is a strong narrative device, but the transition could be smoother. The abrupt shift from the intimate act of writing to the expansive rooftop scene might disrupt the emotional flow. A more gradual transition could enhance the connection between these two moments.
The imagery of the city waking up is powerful, but it could be further developed to reflect Theodore's internal journey. For instance, incorporating more sensory details about the environment—sounds, smells, and the feeling of the cold air—could deepen the audience's immersion in the scene.
The ending, while visually poetic with the birds flying away, feels somewhat abrupt. It might benefit from a more explicit emotional resolution or reflection from Theodore, allowing the audience to understand his state of mind as he moves forward.

Suggestions

Consider adding a few more lines of dialogue between Theodore and Amy to explore their feelings about Samantha's departure and their own emotional states. This could deepen their connection and provide more context for their actions.
Slow down the pacing of the scene, particularly during the transition from Theodore's apartment to the rooftop. Allow for moments of silence or reflection that can enhance the emotional impact.
Enhance the sensory details in the rooftop scene to create a more immersive experience for the audience. Describe the sounds of the city waking up, the chill of the morning air, and the visual beauty of the dawn.
Refine the transition between the letter writing and the rooftop scene to create a more seamless flow. Perhaps include a moment where Theodore reflects on the letter before moving to the rooftop, linking the two actions more closely.
Consider adding a final line or moment that encapsulates Theodore's emotional journey, providing a sense of closure or a hint of hope as he watches the birds disperse.