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Scene 1 -  February 1st
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 8
GROUNDHOG DAY

by
Danny Rubin .




Second Revision by
Harold Ramis
January 7, 1992
FADE IN
HIBERNATING GROUNDHOGS
A family of groundhogs is nestled together in their burrow
sleeping off the end of a long winter.
ROLL CREDITS AND THEME MUSIC
DISSOLVE TO:

EXT. A FOREST CLEARING - EARLY MORNING
The crust of an old snowfall still covers the frozen ground,
and the bare, icy branches of the trees glisten dully in the
early morning light.
CUT TO:

INT. TV STUDIO - SAME TIME
PHIL CONNORS is standing in front of a blank green wall
gesticulating animatedly at some invisible images on the wall,
talking a mile a minute (MOS) . He looks completely crazy as he
points at nothing and winks to an unseen audience.
CUT TO:

EXT. WESTERN PENNSYLVANIA - SAME TIME
CREDITS CONTINUE as we streak across the winter landscape,
flying over fields and farms, small towns and hamlets, railroad
lines and interstates, coalyards and factories, until we cross
the Allegheny River and follow it to the southwest.
CUT TO:

INT. TV STUDIO - SAME TIME
Phil continues pointing out features on the blank wall , but
from a new angle we can see that he ' s looking at a monitor out
of the corner of his eye which shows the chromakey insert he's
pointing to — a national weather map.
CUT TO:

EXT. NEAR PITTSBURGH - SAME TIME
The country towns turn to suburbs, traffic on the roads gets
heavier and finally we see the skyline of Pittsburgh and the
confluence of the Allegheny with the Monongahela and the Ohio.
-2-

We zoom into a tall building in the downtown area and
DISSOLVE TO:

INT. PHIL CONNORS' OFFICE - MORNING
We don't see anyone at first but the office itself speaks
volumes about it's inhabitant— team pictures of the Steelers
from the Franco Harris-Terry Bradshaw glory years, a framed
memorial portrait of Roberto Clemente, a local Emmy award
statue, an erasable weather map and mountains of personal junk
on the desk, ^windowsill, and every other available surface.
As the CREDITS END, we notice a sleeping figure on the small
sofa, buried deep under a pile of coats and a stolen airline
blanket.
GIL HAWLEY, Executive Producer of the Action News, sticks his
head in the door.
HAWLEY
Christ, what a pit. Phil"
The sleeping figure rouses himself and looks out at Hawley.
It's Phil, the .Channel 9 Action News weatherman.
PHIL
(sleepy)
What?
HAWLEY
It's February first, Phil. You
know what tomorrow is?
Phil sits up and.thinks hard. He's in his mid-thirties, smart,
rugged-looking, perhaps a little too full of himself, but
clearly a guy with a lot of personality.
PHIL
(catching on)
Oh, no! Not again.
He jumps up and exits the office with Hawley right behind him.
PHIL
Forget it! I'm not going.

INT. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS
Hawley pursues Phil through the office suite of the Channel 9
Action News, from the look of it a typical, big city, local
news operation. A logo on the wall identifies the station as
WPGH - Pittsburgh.
Phil ducks into the studio.
-3-
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil Connors, a weatherman, tries to avoid going somewhere on February 1st. The nature of the conflict is unclear, as is its resolution.
Strengths
  • Strong character introduction
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Effective setting establishment
Weaknesses
  • Low emotional impact
  • Mild conflict
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a strong visual of hibernating groundhogs, but the transition to Phil Connors in the TV studio feels abrupt and disjointed.
  • The introduction of Phil gesturing at a blank wall in the TV studio is a bit confusing and doesn't immediately establish his character or the setting clearly.
  • The montage of Western Pennsylvania and Pittsburgh feels disconnected from the initial scene with the groundhogs and Phil in the studio.
  • The cluttered office of Phil is described in detail, but it's not clear how this setting relates to the overall story or character development.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Hawley about February 1st and Phil's reluctance to go somewhere lacks depth and doesn't provide much insight into Phil's character or motivations.
Suggestions
  • Consider a smoother transition between the hibernating groundhogs and Phil in the TV studio to establish a clearer connection between the two scenes.
  • Focus on introducing Phil's character and setting up his personality and motivations more effectively in the TV studio scene.
  • Streamline the montage sequences of Western Pennsylvania and Pittsburgh to ensure they flow seamlessly and contribute to the overall narrative.
  • Use the cluttered office setting to reveal more about Phil's character, his relationships with other characters, and his internal conflicts.
  • Revise the dialogue between Phil and Hawley to add depth to their interaction and provide more insight into Phil's reluctance to go somewhere.



Scene 2 -  Phil Gets Assigned the Groundhog Festival
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 9
INT. STUDIO - CONTINUOUS
Hawley follows him in and catches up with him at the weather
corner of the Action News set. Phil starts putting weather
stats up on a chart.
PHIL
Get away from me. I'm working.
HAWLEY
So what's the outlook? We gonna
get that blizzard?
Phil shakes his head and points to the chart which is headed
"Phil's Phorecast" with a cute caricature of himself drawn next
to the title.
PHIL
No way. All that moisture coming
up from the Gulf is going to miss
us completely and take a dump on
Harrisburg.
HAWLEY
(with authority)
Good, 'cause you're going up to
Punxsutawney to cover the
groundhog story tomorrow morning
and I want you back here in time
to do the five.
PHIL
Jesus, Gil, give me a break, will
you! I covered the goddamn
groundhog last year and the year
before that.
HAWLEY
And you'll do it :next year and
the year after, too. When I
worked in San Diego, I covered
the swallows coming back to
Capistrano for ten years in a
row.
PHIL
You should've killed the guy who
made you do that.
HAWLEY
I wanted to do it.
PHIL
Then you should've killed
yourself. I don't want to get
stuck with the groundhog for the
rest of my life.
-4-

HAWLEY
It's a cute story. He comes out,
he looks around, he wrinkles up
his little nose, he sniffs around
a little, he sees his shadow, he
doesn't see his shadow— it's
nice. People like it.
PHIL
Many people are morons.
HAWLEY
Just do it.
PHIL
What'11 you give me?
Hawley looks across the studio and sees RITA HANSON enter, a
very attractive segment producer in her late twenties.
HAWLEY
(to Phil)
I'll give you Rita.
(calls her over)
Rita, could you come here for a
second? I got a little job for
you.
Rita is relatively new to the station, but very competent,
personable, humorous, self-assured and very pretty— in short,
a genuine princess, though Phil is too self-absorbed at this
point to realize it.
PHIL
(teasing)
You can't send Rita out on a
story like this. She's just a
cub, a pup, still wet behind the
ears. Look at her. Her ears are
sopping wet. This needs a
Woodward or a Bernstein. It's a
big story. People need to know.
RITA
(intrigued)
What's the story?
HAWLEY
The Punxsutawney Groundhog
Festival.
RITA
Gil, if it's all right with you
I ' d rather follow-up on the
nurses' strike.
-5-

HAWLEY
You can do the nurses when you
get back. Just take the squeaky
wheel here up to Punxsutawney and
get him back in one piece. Okay?
RITA
Yeah, okay.
Hawley exits leaving Phil and Rita alone in the studio. She
knows Phil mainly by his reputation and it isn't good. Still,
she finds him appealing in an odd way.
PHIL
(pleasantly)
You know, this could be extremely
interesting.
RITA
I've never done a weather story
before. What's Punxsutawney
like?
PHIL
Oh, it's an enchanted place. A
magical world. It's the
Constantinople of the whole
Western Appalachian-Susquehanna
Drainage system.
RITA
Do you always joke?
PHIL
About 70 to 80% of the time.
Inside I'm actually a very shy
and sensitive person.
RITA
A lot of people around here think
you're not very sincere.
PHIL
Tell me the names of these
people.
RITA
I'll line up a crew and
transportation. If you don't
feel like driving, we can all go
up in the van together.
PHIL
I think I'll take my own car.
I ' m not that fond of my fellow
man.
-6-


RITA
(exiting)
Nice attitude.
PHIL
Nice face.
(calls after her)
Why don't you ride up with me?
RITA
No, thanks.
STEPHANIE DECASTRO , an attractive, dark-eyed, dark-haired
correspondent, glares at Phil from across the studio.
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil, a jaded weatherman, is assigned to cover the Punxsutawney Groundhog Festival by his news director, Hawley. Phil initially resists but agrees when he learns that Rita Hanson, a competent and attractive segment producer, will be going with him. Rita is intrigued by the story despite Phil's teasing, and they agree to go to Punxsutawney together. Stephanie Decastro, a correspondent, glares at Phil as he and Rita make their plans.
Strengths
  • Sharp dialogue
  • Character dynamics
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Lack of emotional depth
  • Slightly predictable
Critique
  • The scene sets up the dynamic between Phil and Hawley well, showcasing Phil's reluctance to cover the groundhog story and his sarcastic attitude towards it.
  • The introduction of Rita adds a new element to the scene, showing her competence and willingness to take on the assignment despite Phil's teasing.
  • The banter between Phil and Rita establishes their initial interactions and sets the stage for their relationship development.
  • Stephanie's glare at Phil hints at potential conflicts or tensions in the future.
  • The dialogue is witty and engaging, capturing the personalities of the characters effectively.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more depth to Phil's reluctance to cover the groundhog story, perhaps hinting at underlying reasons for his disdain.
  • Explore Rita's character further by delving into her motivations for taking on the assignment and her initial impressions of Phil.
  • Introduce subtle foreshadowing elements related to Stephanie's glare to build anticipation for future developments.
  • Enhance the comedic elements in the dialogue to further engage the audience and highlight the humor in the interactions between the characters.
  • Consider incorporating visual cues or actions to complement the dialogue and enhance the overall scene.



Scene 3 -  Packing for Punxsutawney and Breaking Up
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
INT. PHIL'S OFFICE - LATER
Phil is in his cluttered cubicle talking on a headset phone
while he reviews cassettes of his groundhog spots from the past
two years on a small monitor. As he talks, he stuffs a number
of personal items in an overnight bag, all the time watching
himself on the TV monitor.
PHIL
(on the phone)
They don't really think of me as
a weatherman around here. More
of a "personality," but with the
credibility of a first-class
broadcast journalist. Once you
look at my tape I think you'll
see what they mean.
Stephanie enters and stands in the doorway looking at Phil for
a long moment. There is something vaguely off-center about
this woman, not quite FATAL ATTRACTION but still a little
scary.
STEPHANIE
(bitterly)
I just want to know one thing:
did I do something wrong or are
you just tired of me or what? I
have to know.
Phil sighs.
PHIL
(on the phone)
Dan, can I call you back? I've
just been handed something and I
better get on it...
(he picks up some
papers and rustles
them for effect)
...Okay, thanks.
-7-

He takes off the headset, gets up and closes the door for
privacy.
PHIL
(kindly)
You didn't do anything wrong,
Stephanie, and I ' m not tired of
you. It's just that I don't have
time for a real relationship
right now. I told you that the
first time we went out.
STEPHANIE
(getting close)
Everybody says that at the
beginning of a relationship.
PHIL
(gently pushing her
away)
I'm different. I really meant
it! Things are really starting
to move for me now. I ' m not
going to be doing the weather for
the rest of my life. I was just
talking to the CBS guy about a
network job. I want that. This
is just the beginning for me. I
can't waste any more time.
STEPHANIE
Are you saying our relationship
was a waste of time?
PHIL
Our relationship? We went out a
total of four times! And only
twice did anything happen. It
was fun but I don't see that as
a big commitment.
STEPHANIE
(closing in again)
I had our charts done. My
astrologer says we're extremely
compatible. There may even be
some past lives involvement here.
PHIL
See? So we've already done this.
Let's move on. Next case.
STEPHANIE
You know what's wrong with you,
Phil? You're selfish. You don't
have time for anyone but
yourself.
-8-

PHIL
That's what I ' m trying to tell
you. You don't want to be with
me. You can do better. Look,
Stephanie, if I ever said or did
anything to mislead you I'm sorry
for that, but right now I have to
do this groundhog thing and I
don't have a handle on it yet.
He throws some papers and his datebook into a briefcase and
puts on his jacket.
PHIL (CONT.)
I'll tell you what. I ' m going to
do some serious thinking while
I ' m in Punxsutawney, okay?
He pats her on the shoulder and brushes past her, leaving her
standing there with a malevolent look on her face.
CUT TO:

EXT. A HIGHWAY - AFTERNOON
A VAN marked ".Channel 9 Action News" speeds along a two-lane
highway through the winter landscape of West Central
Pennsylvania. Mounted atop the van is a microwave transmitter.
Rita is riding up front with LARRY, the union cameraman and
techie. Phil is following close behind the van in a new Lexus
coupe. His car has a bumper-sticker that reads "Weathermen
Like it Wet."
PHIL (V.O.)
(on his earphone)
I'm on my way to Punxsutawney...
(forced to repeat it,
a little embarrassed)
Punx^su-taw-ney....Work or fun?
I think that all depends on you.

INT. THE LEXUS - CONTINUOUS
Phil is talking to one of his girlfriends, sorting through a
stack of CD's, as usual, grabbing at the good life with both
hands.
PHIL
. . . . I thought maybe you could
meet me up there tonight and let
me vulgarize you for about seven
hours....So I ' m supposed to spend
the night in Punxsutawney all
alone? Thanks.
Phil loads a CD and a great, driving song kicks in.
CUT TO:
A SIGN
"Welcome to Punxsutawney - The Original Weather Capitol of the
World Since 1887." Depicted on the sign is a large cartoon
GROUNDHOG wearing a top hat and clutching an umbrella under his
arm.
The mini-convoy passes some fast food places on the outskirts
of town.

EXT. MAIN STREET - PUNXSUTAWNEY - LATER
The van drives along , the small-town main drag. There are
cartoon groundhogs everywhere you look and the whole town has
been gaily festooned with banners and bunting.
Genres: ["Comedy","Romance","Drama"]

Summary Phil prepares for a work trip to Punxsutawney while facing Stephanie's questions about the end of their relationship. He explains the decision is due to his career ambitions, dismissing Stephanie's astrological love predictions. Phil promises to consider their relationship during his absence, but Stephanie expresses resentment and calls him selfish. Despite Phil's attempts to maintain a professional demeanor, the conversation becomes progressively awkward and strained as Stephanie confronts him about his lack of commitment and his dismissal of her feelings.
Strengths
  • Well-developed characters
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Effective setup for future events
Weaknesses
  • Relatively low stakes
  • Some cliched romantic dialogue
Critique
  • The scene effectively sets up the conflict between Phil and Stephanie, showcasing Phil's self-centered nature and Stephanie's desire for a committed relationship.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Stephanie feels natural and reveals their differing perspectives on their relationship.
  • Stephanie's astrological love predictions add an interesting layer to her character and the dynamics between her and Phil.
  • The scene transitions smoothly from Phil's office to the highway, setting the stage for the upcoming events in Punxsutawney.
  • The introduction of Rita and Larry in the van adds depth to the story and hints at the dynamics between the characters.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual cues to enhance the cluttered nature of Phil's office, providing a stronger visual representation of his character.
  • Explore deeper into Stephanie's character to give more context to her actions and motivations, adding complexity to the relationship dynamics.
  • Introduce subtle foreshadowing elements related to Punxsutawney and the Groundhog Day event to build anticipation for the upcoming scenes.
  • Consider adding a bit more tension or emotional depth to the interaction between Phil and Stephanie to further engage the audience.
  • Ensure a smooth transition between the office scene and the highway scene to maintain the flow of the narrative.



Scene 4 -  Phil's Groundhog Day Arrival
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 9
EXT. MOTEL - LATER
The van pulls into the parking lot at a Quality Inn. The
announcement billboard in ;front of the motel reads: "Groundhog
Day Breakfast Special - Feb.2 - All You Can Eat - $5.99." The
parking area is already crowded with cars including a number of
other news vans. The Lexus pulls in behind the van and
everybody gets out.
Phil takes one look at the motel and shakes his head.
PHIL
(calls out)
Rita! I can't stay here.
Rita is already helping Larry unload equipment from the van.
LARRY
(muttering)
Prima donnas.
RITA
It's okay. I'll handle it.
She crosses to the Lexus where Phil is trying to make another
call on his earphone.
RITA
What's the problem, Phil?
PHIL
I hate this place. I stayed here
two years ago and I was
miserable. It's like a minimum
security prison. I'm not staying
here.
-10-


RITA
You're not staying here.
PHIL
(brightening)
I'm not?
RITA
No, Larry and I don't care but I
thought you might, so I booked
you at a very nice bed and
breakfast on Cherry Street.
Here's the address.
She hands him a card.
PHIL
(pleased)
Great. That's great. That's the
mark of a really good producer.
Making the talent happy.
RITA
Whatever I can do.
PHIL
Really? Will you be my love
slave?
RITA
Whatever I can do within reason.
Would you like to have dinner
with Larry and me?
PHIL
No thanks, I've seen Larry eat.
Why don't you ditch Larry and let
me take you someplace nice?
RITA
You mean like a date?
PHIL
Yeah.
RITA
Oh, no.
PHIL
Okay. I get it. You're a little
intimidated by me, you're all
excited about the shoot tomorrow,
you want everything to go just
perfect. I understand. You just
get some sleep. Tomorrow will be
great.
-11-

RITA
Well, that's something to look
forward to. I'll see you in the
morning.
He drives off, leaving her standing there shaking her head.
LARRY
Did he actually call himself "the
talent?"
Larry snorts and continues unloading their gear.
CUT TO:

EXT. CHERRY STREET - DAWN
The first light of morning colors the sky behind the Cherry
Street Inn, a rambling, white Victorian bed and breakfast.
CLOSE UP - CLOCK
A digital clock-radio changes from 5:59 to 6:00 AM. The radio
comes on, playing the end of the Sonny and Cher hit, "I Got
You, Babe."
SUPER: FEBRUARY 2

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - DAWN
Phil sits up in bed and looks around the room. The decor is
typical bed and breakfast, flocked wallpaper, framed prints,
and an odd assortment of mismatched furniture. His suit is
hanging neatly on the back of the closet door and his suitcase
is open on a stand at the foot of the bed, still neatly packed.
A iradio, DEEJAY and his SIDEKICK come on with hyped-up,
drivetime Chappy talk." Phil stares at the radio and listens
to them.
DEEJAY
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's COOOLD out there
today1
Phil grimaces and swings out of bed.
SIDEKICK
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this— Miami Beach?
The deejay laughs. Phil shakes his head at the cheesy repartee
as he crosses to the sink and starts brushing his teeth.
-12-

DEEJAY
Not hardly. And you can expect
hazardous travel later today with
that, you know, blizzard thing—
SIDEKICK
That "blizzard thing?"
Phil splashes some water on his face and prepares to shave.
SIDEKICK (CONT.)
Oh, here's the report: the
National Weather Service is
calling for a big blizzard thing.
DEEJAY
Yes they are, but there's another
reason today is very special—
SIDEKICK
Especially cold—
DEEJAY
Especially cold, okay, but the
big question on everybody's lips—
SIDEKICK
Chapped lips—
DEEJAY
:—on their chapped lips, right—
Do you think Phil's going to come
out and see his shadow?
SIDEKICK
Punxsutawney Phil.
Phil looks up at himself in the mirror, admiring his own face.
DEEJAY
That's right, rodent lovers!
It's—
BOTH DEEJAYS
Groundhog Day1
SOUND EFFECT of GRUNTING GROUNDHOGS.
Phil grunts at his reflection in the mirror.
PHIL
(to himself)
Never again.
CUT TO:
-13-

INT. CORRIDOR - DAWN
Phil heads for the breakfast room of the inn, now well-dressed
in a suit and tie, a nice overcoat slung over his arm. A
CHUBBY MAN passes.
CHUBBY MAN
Morning .
PHIL
Morning .
CHUBBY MAN
Think it'll be an early Spring?
PHIL
I ' m predicting March 21st.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Romance"]

Summary Phil Connors arrives at a Groundhog Day event refusing to stay at the Quality Inn due to a bad prior experience. Producer Rita books him at a bed and breakfast. Phil asks Rita to dinner but she declines his offer, leaving him to wake up the next day to hear a radio broadcast about Groundhog Day.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character dynamics
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant emotional impact
  • Low stakes
Critique
  • The scene transitions smoothly from the motel parking lot to Cherry Street Inn, providing a clear sense of location and time progression.
  • Phil's reluctance to stay at the Quality Inn due to a bad past experience adds depth to his character and sets up his interaction with Rita.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita is engaging and reveals their dynamic well, showcasing Phil's charm and Rita's professionalism.
  • The radio broadcast in the morning adds a touch of humor and foreshadows the Groundhog Day events, creating anticipation for what's to come.
  • Phil's interaction with the Chubby Man in the corridor adds a light-hearted moment and sets the tone for the day ahead.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual descriptions to enhance the setting of the Quality Inn parking lot and Cherry Street Inn, painting a vivid picture for the audience.
  • Explore Phil's emotions further when he hears the radio broadcast about Groundhog Day, perhaps showing a hint of frustration or resignation.
  • Develop Rita's character more during the interaction with Phil, showcasing her reactions to his comments and gestures to add depth to their relationship.
  • Introduce subtle hints or clues about the time loop element to intrigue the audience and foreshadow the events to come.
  • Consider incorporating more sensory details to immerse the audience in the scene, such as the sounds and smells of the morning at the inn.



Scene 5 -  Breakfast at Mrs. Lancaster's
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 9
INT. BREAKFAST ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil enters the old library of the house now set up with a
breakfast buffet. An old spinet piano stands in the corner.
One wall is lined with .bookcases filled with books. A handful
of guests are seated around the room, eating.
The matron of the house, MRS. LANCASTER, spots Phil as she
comes out of the kitchen with a fresh pot of coffee.
MRS. LANCASTER
Did you sleep well, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
(with mock civility)
Like a Roumanian orphan, Mrs.
Lancaster.
MRS. LANCASTER
Would you like some coffee?
PHIL
I don't suppose it1 d be possible
to get an espresso or a capuccino
around here.
MRS. LANCASTER
(blankly)
I don't really know —
PHIL
Forget it. This '11 be fine.
-14-

MRS. LANCASTER
(as she pours)
I wonder what the weather's going
to be like for all the
festivities.
PHIL
My guess is it'11 be cold and
overcast, high today in the low
30's, dropping to the low 20's
tonight, but I'm predicting that
all that moisture coming up from
the Gulf is going to miss us and
dump some locally heavy snow,
possibly blizzard conditions with
travel advisories in the
Harrisburg area and maybe as far
east as .Philadelphia.
(off her surprised
look)
You want to talk weather, you
asked the right guy.
He heads for the door.
;MRS. LANCASTER •
:
Oh, will you be checking out
today, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
Unfortunately yes.
Phil exits.
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EXT. BOARDING HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Sipping at the steaming coffee, Phil manages to put on his coat
and gloves as he descends the front steps of the house and
joins the flow of pedestrian traffic on the street.

EXT. MAIN STREET -KPUNXSUTAWNEY - CONTINUOUS
There are a lot of people on the street for this hour. Traffic
is so heavy in fact, the pedestrians are moving faster than the
cars. Everyone seems to be going in the same direction, making
the annual trek to see the groundhog.
An OLD BUM is sitting on the sidewalk leaning against a
storefront. Someone throws him a coin. Phil walks by without
taking any notice.
MAN (O.C.)
Hey, Phil!
-15-


A big pie-faced man, NED RYERSON, comes huffing and puffing
right up to him. There is something about this guy that makes
us dislike him on sight.
NED
Phil! Phil Connors! I thought
that was you!
Phil looks at him vaguely.
PHIL
(at a loss)
I'm sorry. Have we— uh—
NED
My oh my! Phil Connors. Don't
say you don't remember me, 'cause
I sure as heckrfire remember you.
Well?
Phil stares, trying to remember.
NED
Ned Ryerson? Needlenose Ned?
Ned the Head. Come on, buddy.
Case Western High?
PHIL
Ned?
NED
I see you clicking through that
brain of yours. Click-click,
click-click, click-click—Bing!
Ned Ryerson, did the whistling
trick with my belly button in the
talent show. Bing! Ned Ryerson,
got the shingles real bad senior
^year^ almost didn't graduate.
Bing again! Ned Ryerson, went
out with your sister Mary Pat a
couple of times— 'til you told
me not to anymore. Well?

PHIL
(resigned)
Ned Ryerson.
NED
Bing!
PHIL
So what're you doing with
yourself, Ned?
NED
Phil, I sell insurance.
-16-

PHIL
(sorry he asked)
No kidding.
NED
Do you have life insurance, Phil?
'Cause if you do, I bet you could
use more— who couldn't?—but I
got a feeling you don't have any.
Am I right?
PHIL
You know, Ned, I ' d love to talk
to you but I really have to—
Phil starts to walk away,,but Ned won't take the hint.
NED
That's okay. I'll walk with you.
When I see an opportunity, I
charge it, like a bull. Ned the
Bull, that's me now. Some of my
friends live and die by actuarial
tables, but I think it's all just
a crap shoot anyhoo. Ever heard
of single .premium life? That
could be the ticket for you,
buddy. God, it's good to see
you! Hey, what're you doing for
dinner?
PHIL
Dinner? Umm, I don't think
that's going to work for me.
As they continue walking, Phil steps into what looks like a
shallow puddle and ends up ankle deep in wet slush. Ned laughs
like a donkey.
NED
Hey, look out for that first
step! It's a doozy!
Phil looks at him with murderous contempt.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil Connors enters a breakfast room, where he is greeted by Mrs. Lancaster. Despite his sarcasm, she offers him coffee, and they discuss the weather. Phil predicts snow and leaves to join the crowd heading to see Punxsutawney Phil. On his way, he encounters Ned Ryerson, who tries to sell him insurance and invites him to dinner. Phil declines and accidentally steps in a puddle, much to Ryerson's amusement.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character dynamics
  • Setting
Weaknesses
  • Minimal character development
  • Low emotional impact
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear direction or purpose, as it meanders from Phil's interaction with Mrs. Lancaster to his encounter with Ned Ryerson without a strong connection between the two.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster feels forced and unnatural, lacking depth or meaningful interaction.
  • The introduction of Ned Ryerson feels abrupt and out of place, disrupting the flow of the scene and leaving the audience confused.
  • There is a lack of character development or emotional depth in the interactions, making it difficult for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The transition between the different interactions feels disjointed and could be smoother to maintain the coherence of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Focus on establishing a clear purpose or goal for the scene to drive the interactions and dialogue forward.
  • Develop the relationship between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster to add depth and authenticity to their interaction.
  • Integrate Ned Ryerson's introduction more seamlessly into the scene to ensure it feels organic and relevant to the overall story.
  • Work on building emotional depth and character development in the interactions to engage the audience and create a more compelling narrative.
  • Improve the transitions between different interactions to maintain the coherence and flow of the scene.



Scene 6 -  Punxsutawney Predicts More Winter
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 9
EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
A big crowd is standing in a park-like clearing off a
residential street. They are gathered around a large mound of
dirt enclosed by a rail fence, waiting for the big moment. For
a cold gray dawn, there is the atmosphere of a festival here.
An area close to the mound is roped off for news reporters and
cameras. Rita stands there, a pocket of genuine beauty in this
sea of potbellied old union guys and blow-dried reporters.
-17-


Stomping her feet against the cold, Rita looks at her watch and
glances around. Larry, the cameraman, just looks bored.
RITA
How could he be late?
LARRY
Prima donnas.
RITA
It's just so— inconsiderate.
LARRY
What happens to some people?
They're born nice. They grow up
nice. You put 'em on TV and -
bam! Prima donnas.
Rita spots Phil heading into the crowd.
RITA
Here he comes. Phil! Hey, Phil.
Over here!
Phil joins them in the press area. Rita pulls him to his mark
near the rail fence.
RITA
Where've you been?
PHIL
I got hung up with some jerk I
went to high school with. So,
did you sleep okay without me?
You tossed and turned, didn't
you?
Rita holds up a slate for Larry to ID the tape.
RITA
You're incredible.
PHIL
Who told you?
RITA
Ready when you are.
Phil takes the microphone from Rita and positions himself
against the fence.
The Groundhog Club Officials in top hats, striped trousers and
cutaway coats parade out to the burrow that houses Punxsutawney
Phil.
RITA
Looks like they're starting.
Roll tape.
-18-

LARRY
Rolling.
Rita silently counts down from five and cues Phil who instantly
snaps into announce mode.
PHIL
(to camera)
Once a year, the eyes of the
nation turn here, to this tiny
hamlet in Pennsylvania, to watch
a master at work. The master?
Punxsutawney Phil, the world's
most famous weatherman, the
groundhog, who, as legend has it,
can predict the coming of an
early spring.
Rita turns to Larry. This is impressive— so far, so good.
A Groundhog Club Official kneels at the burrow and
ceremoniously knocks on the small wooden door, then opens it
and retreats.
PHIL
And here's the big moment we've
all been waiting for. Let's just
see what Mr. Groundhog has to
say.
The groundhog sticks his head out, looks around, steps out of
the hole, and runs over to the other side of the mound, about
as far away from the cameras as he can get.
PHIL
Hey! Over here, you little
weasel!
Larry zooms in as far as he can but the best he can manage is
a close-up of the groundhog's back. The groundhog stands there
a moment, his body casting a long shadow, then he lets out a
squeak and runs back into the hole.
PHIL
Great shot, huh, folks? Well,
that was certainly worth the
trip. Now we'll be hearing from
Mr. Buster Greene, President of
the Punxsutawney Groundhog Club,
the so-called Seer of Seers who
will interpret for us.
BUSTER GREENE, dressed up in his top hat and cutaway coat,
walks onto the mound and hushes the crowd.
-19-


B U ST E R
He came out, and he saw his
shadow. Sorry, ladies and
gentlemen, but it looks like it's
going to be a long winter.
The crowd lets out a good-natured "Awwwwww" in disappointment.
PHIL
(sarcastic, to camera)
Well, that's it. Sorry you
couldn't be here in person to
share the electric moment. This
is one event where televison
really fails to capture the
excitement of thousands of people
gathered to watch a large
squirrel predict the weather, and
I for one am deeply grateful to
have been a part of it.
Reporting for Channel 9, this is
Phil Connors.
Larry cuts the camera.
RITA
(to Phil)
You want to try one that's a
little sweeter?
PHIL
(to Rita)
That's as sweet as I get. I'm
outa here.
As he exits, Phil tosses the mike to Larry, who isn't expecting
the throw and bobbles it, dropping the mike on the ground.
LARRY
(mutters)
Prima donnas.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary On a cold gray dawn, a crowd gathers at Gobbler's Knob in Punxsutawney, Pennsylvania, to witness Punxsutawney Phil predict the arrival of spring. Reporter Rita waits with cameraman Larry for Phil, who arrives late and dismisses Rita. When Phil emerges from his burrow, he runs away from the cameras, leading Club President Buster Greene to predict a long winter. Phil delivers a sarcastic on-camera commentary and exits, tossing the microphone to Larry, who drops it.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character interactions
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Low conflict level
  • Limited character development
Critique
  • The scene effectively sets the stage for the Groundhog Day event with a detailed description of the setting and the atmosphere of the festival.
  • The dialogue between Rita, Phil, and Larry adds humor and character dynamics to the scene, showcasing Phil's sarcastic and dismissive attitude.
  • Phil's on-camera commentary is witty and sarcastic, adding a layer of humor to the otherwise mundane event.
  • The interaction between Phil and Rita at the end of the scene hints at their dynamic and sets up potential conflicts and resolutions in their relationship.
  • The scene effectively captures the essence of the Groundhog Day tradition and the quirky nature of the event.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more depth to Phil's character by exploring his internal struggles and motivations behind his sarcastic behavior.
  • Enhance the conflict between Phil and Rita by delving deeper into their contrasting personalities and goals.
  • Add more visual elements to enhance the description of the festival and the interactions between the characters.
  • Explore the theme of personal growth and redemption through Phil's experiences at the Groundhog Day event.
  • Consider incorporating a subplot or secondary conflict to add complexity to the scene and engage the audience further.



Scene 7 -  Confrontation and Mishaps
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 9
INT. DINER - LATER
Phil is sitting alone having a cup of coffee in a busy, loud
and lively cafe. Rita enters, sees him sitting there, crosses
to his table and sits down across from him.
RITA
That was really lousy.
PHIL
Is it my fault the little rat
went south on us?
-20-

RITA
A real professional would have
handled it. You acted like it
was a personal insult. Who do
you think you are — Wolf Blitzer?
PHIL
God, you really take this stuff
seriously, don't you.
RITA
Yes, I do. As far as I ' m
concerned there are no little
stories, Phil. Only little
reporters with big egos who think
they're too good for the job they
have to do.
PHIL
(trying to look hurt)
You really don't know me very
well, do you. 'Cause if you did
you could never say something
like that about me. I care!
Call me a cockeyed optimist but
I happen to think there's more to
this job than just getting my
ugly mug on the boob tube every
night.
RITA
Is that so.
PHIL
Yes, that is so.
Rita is so irritated by him she can't even respond.
Phil looks at her evenly for a long moment.
PHIL
So as far as us getting together,
would you say the glass is half
empty or half full?
Larry pokes his head in the doorway, looks around, spots Rita
and makes his way over to their table.
LARRY
(to Rita)
You ready? We better get going
if we ' re going to stay ahead of
the weather.
PHIL
You don't have to rush off, you
know. That storm is 'going to
miss us completely.
-21-

RITA
Nice working with you, Phil. See
you around.
Rita walks away, leaving him sitting alone.
CUT TO:
«*


EXT. HIGHWAY - DAY
Phil's Lexus is driving down the highway. Light snow is just
starting to fall.
PHIL(V.O)
(on the earphone)
I'll call you after I see the
network guy. I should be back
there in a couple of
hours...What?...1 can't hear you—
you're breaking up...Hello?
Sabrina?

INT. THE CAR - CONTINUOUS
Phil is getting annoyed as the phone connection deteriorates.
The snow is getting heavier. Phil switches on the windshield
wipers.
PHIL
Sabrina? Can you hear me? Shit!
He slams the phone back into it's cradle, then looks up and
notices slow traffic up ahead. He honks his horn as the
traffic comes to a complete stop. He keeps honking but nothing
moves.
He rolls down the window and looks up ahead. The highway is a
parking lot.
PHIL
No. No!

EXT. THE CAR - CONTINUOUS
Phil jumps out and begins to walk down the highway, past the
parked cars, shivering in his light sweater and silk sport
shirt. The snowfall is getting heavier and the wind is pickin
up. The snow comes down unnaturally hard and fast. He walks
on, slipping and sliding in his expensive loafers until he
j comes to a police roadblock up ahead, manned by TWO HIGHWAY
"J PATROLMEN.
PHIL
What's going on, Officer?
-22-

PATROLMAN
Nothin's goin1 on. We're closin1
the road. Big accident up ahead.
Blizzard movin1 in.
PHIL
What blizzard? A couple of
flakes! An isolated phenomenon
of nature.
PATROLMAN
Are you nuts? We got a major
storm movin' in.
PHIL
No, no. All that moisture is
going to miss us and hit
Harrisburg.
PATROLMAN
Pal, you got that moisture on
your head.
PHIL
But I have to get to Pittsburgh
today!
PATROLMAN
Mister, the only place anybody's
goin' on this road is back to
Punxsutawney.
Phil glowers at him and shivers.
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INT. GAS STATION - LATER
Phil is on a pay phone. Snow is falling heavily outside.
GAS STATION ATTENDANT is shovelling around the pumps.
PHIL
So all the long distance lines
are down? What about the
satellite? Is it snowing in
space?...But I have to call
Pittsburgh...Isn't there some
special line you keep open for
emergencies or for
celebrities?...Well, I'm both
really. I'm a celebrity in an
emergency. Can you patch me
through on that line?
-23-

The door opens and Phil is blasted with frigid Arctic wind and
blowing snow. The GAS STATION ATTENDANT enters the tiny office
and in trying to squeeze past Phil accidentally bangs him on
the head with his snow shovel.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Romance","Drama"]

Summary Phil and Rita's diner meeting escalates into an argument about their differing views on journalism. Amidst a blizzard, Phil finds shelter at a gas station but is accidentally hit by a snow shovel.
Strengths
  • Sharp dialogue
  • Character dynamics
  • Conflict development
Weaknesses
  • Limited physical action
  • Lack of visual variety
Critique
  • The scene in the diner between Phil and Rita lacks depth and emotional resonance. The dialogue feels forced and the interaction between the characters comes off as superficial.
  • The conflict between Phil and Rita is not fully explored or developed, leading to a lack of tension and engagement in the scene.
  • The tone of the scene is inconsistent, shifting between lighthearted banter and more serious moments without a clear transition.
  • The character of Phil comes across as flippant and dismissive, which makes it difficult for the audience to empathize with him or root for his character development.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels contrived and lacks authenticity, making it challenging for the audience to connect with the characters and their motivations.
Suggestions
  • Add more depth to the conversation between Phil and Rita by exploring their emotions and motivations in a more nuanced way.
  • Develop the conflict between Phil and Rita further to create more tension and drama in the scene.
  • Ensure a consistent tone throughout the scene to maintain the audience's engagement and emotional investment.
  • Provide more insight into Phil's character to make him more relatable and sympathetic to the audience.
  • Revise the dialogue to make it more natural and authentic, allowing the characters to express themselves in a more genuine and compelling manner.



Scene 8 -  Groundhog Day Repeating Ritual
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. HOTEL BAR - EVENING
Phil is at the bar in Punxsutawney ' s oldest and best hotel , the
Pennsylvanian. He looks very bored, drinking a beer,
unsuccessfully hustling an attractive local girl named NANCY.
PHIL
You never saw me on TV-- on the
news?
NANCY
I don't think so. What part of
the news do you do?
PHIL
I ' m the White House correspondent
for NBC news.
NANCY
Oh , I ' m so sure .
PHIL
Ask me anything?
NANCY
Okay, how big is the White House?
PHIL
Three bedrooms, two and a half
baths. Looks much bigger than it
, is.
Nancy just stares at him, clearly not into his sense of humor.
Suddenly, a BRIDE in full white wedding gown and veil rushes
into the bar, crying and shouting. A gaggle of BRIDESMAIDS
flutters around her trying to coax her back to her own wedding
but she won't budge. Then the GROOM, wearing a bad rented tux,
comes storming in and tries to drag her back, until the BEST
MAN restrains him and the bridesmaids hustle the bride away.
Phil watches the whole drama play out, then turns back to
Nancy .
PHIL
Good start. I ' m sure they'll be
very happy. So what do you say?
You want to play doggie obedience
school with me?
-24-

NANCY
Thanks. I'll pass.
She gets up to leave.
PHIL
Sit! Stay!
He watches her go, then tosses a tip on the bar and exits
somewhat unsteadily.
CUT TO:
INSERT - A THICK BOOK
The cover reads "101 Curses, Spells and Enchantments You Can Do
at Home." A well-manicured feminine hand opens the book to a
marked page .

INT. CHERRY STREET INN - NIGHT - SAME TIME
Phil enters his room and drunkenly tosses his overcoat, scarf
and gloves on the floor in a heap.

INT. STEPHANIE'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Stephanie Decastro, Phil ' s disaffected ex-lover, is sitting
cross-legged on the floor with the book of curses open in front
of her. Her hair is down, she's wearing a caftan with a Zodiac
print, there are candles everywhere and other vaguely occult
decorating touches.
INSERT
Phil's business card is dropped into a dish. Then the Tarot
card of the Hanged Man, a chicken bone, and a feather are
placed on top of it .
PHIL
He stands at the sink, looking at himself in the mirror,
flexing his muscles .
STEPHANIE
Reading from the book> she mutters incantations in a secret
language, then she sprinkles some powder on the plate, then a
few drops of oil. Then she makes a few passes over it with her
hands and, much to her surprise, the contents of the plate
spontaneously combust.
PHIL

As he crosses to the bed, he accidentally knocks over the
suitcase stand, spilling his clothes out onto the floor.
-25-

He contemplates picking them up for a moment, decides to leave
them there, and flops down on the bed. He lies there looking
u up at the ceiling until the room starts to spin around, then
he closes his eyes and quickly drops off to sleep, still fully
clothed.
STEPHANIE
To complete the spell, she picks up a broken wristwatch and
drops it into the fire.
INSERT
Phil's business card, the Hanged Man and the broken watch in
flames. The watch crystal is cracked and the hands are frozen
at 5:59.
DISSOLVE TO:
CLOSE UP - CLOCK
The digital clock-radio changes from 5:59 to 6:00 AM. The
radio comes on, playing the end of the Sonny and Cher hit, "I
Got You, Babe," just as it did the day before.

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - DAWN
Phil sits up in bed, quickly alert, and looks around the room.
Something is wrong. He's wearing pajamas, his suit is once
again hanging neatly on the closet door and his suitcase is
back on its stand at the foot of the bed, again neatly packed.
The song ends and the same radio deejay and his sidekick come
on with the same manic energy. Phil stares at the radio and
listens to them. A look of astonishment comes over his face as
they banter.
DEEJAY
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's COOOLD out there
today!
SIDEKICK
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this— Miami Beach?
The deejay laughs. Phil "mock" laughs at exactly the same
time, recognizing the repartee from the previous morning.
PHIL
(to himself)
Nice going guys. That's
yesterday's tape.
Phil crosses to the sink and gets a towel off the rack, only
half-listening to the radio.
-26-

DEEJAY
Not hardly. Expect hazardous
travel later today with that, you
know, blizzard thing —
SIDEKICK
That "blizzard thing?"
Phil turns on the water and splashes some on his face as if
trying to wake himself up, vaguely disturbed by the repetition
of the broadcast.
SIDEKICK (CONT.)
Oh, here's the report: the
National Weather Service is
calling for a big blizzard
thing."
DEEJAY
Yes they are, but there's another
reason today is very special —
SIDEKICK
Especially cold —
DEEJAY
Especially cold, okay, but the
big question on everybody's lips —
Phil supplies the next line in unison with the radio.
SIDEKICK AND PHIL
Chapped lips —
DEEJAY
— on their chapped lips, right —
Do you think Phil's going to come
out and see his shadow?
SIDEKICK
Punxsutawney Phil.
Some vague doubt causes Phil to go to the window.
DEEJAY
That's right, rodent lovers!
It's—
BOTH DEEJAYS
Groundhog Day!
SOUND EFFECT of GRUNTING GROUNDHOGS as Phil pulls back the
curtains and looks out.
HIS POV
The street is full of people heading toward Gobbler's Knob,
exactly as they did the day before.
-27-

PHIL
(aghast)
What the hell?
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Genres: ["Comedy","Romance","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil unsuccessfully flirts with Nancy at a bar and witnesses a bride fleeing her wedding. Meanwhile, Stephanie performs a ritual with Phil's belongings. The next day, Phil wakes up to find the day repeating itself, including the radio broadcast, leading to confusion and disorientation.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Unique concept
  • Engaging characters
Weaknesses
  • Lack of high stakes
  • Some predictable elements
Critique
  • The scene at the hotel bar lacks depth and purpose, as Phil's interaction with Nancy and the bride's dramatic entrance feel disconnected and random.
  • The transition to Stephanie performing a ritual with Phil's belongings feels abrupt and out of place, lacking a clear connection to the previous events.
  • The repetition of the radio broadcast and Phil's realization of the time loop is a strong element, but it could be better integrated with the rest of the scene for a smoother flow.
  • The scene lacks a clear focus or development of character relationships, making it feel disjointed and lacking in emotional depth.
  • The humor in Phil's interactions with Nancy and the radio broadcast could be enhanced by better pacing and timing.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising the scene to have a clearer purpose and connection to the overall story, perhaps by focusing on Phil's internal struggles or relationships with other characters.
  • Integrate Stephanie's ritual in a more seamless and meaningful way, tying it to Phil's journey or character development.
  • Enhance the transition between the different elements of the scene to create a more cohesive narrative flow.
  • Develop the humor and interactions between Phil and other characters to add depth and engagement to the scene.
  • Ensure that each element of the scene serves a purpose in advancing the plot or character development to create a more impactful and cohesive story.



Scene 9 -  The Groundhog Day Awakening
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. BED AND BREAKFAST - DAWN
Phil rushes out into the corridor, hastily tying his tie, his
suit jacket and overcoat over his arm. As he heads for the
breakfast room, the same Chubby Man passes.
CHUBBY MAN
Morning.
PHIL
Morning.
CHUBBY MAN
Think it'll be an early Spring?
PHIL
(stops, irritated)
Didn't we do this yesterday?
CHUBBY MAN
(intimidated)
I don't know what you mean.
Phil grabs him by the front of his shirt and looks deep into
his eyes.
PHIL
Don't mess with me, pork chop.
What day is this?
CHUBBY MAN
(terrified)
February second—Groundhog Day!
Phil can see he's telling the truth and relaxes his grip on the
poor man.
PHIL
Okay. Sorry. I'm having a bad
day.
Phil walks on, leaving the chubby man baffled and insulted.
CHUBBY MAN
(to himself)
I'll say.
-28-

INT. BREAKFAST ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil enters the old library of the house and finds everything
exactly as it was the day before. Mrs. Lancaster spots Phil as
she comes out of the kitchen with the fresh pot of coffee.
MRS. LANCASTER
Did you sleep well, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
(completely confused)
Did I? I don't know—
MRS. LANCASTER
Would you like some coffee?
PHIL
Yes, thank you. I ' m feeling a
little strange.
MRS. LANCASTER
(as she pours)
I wonder what the weather's going
to be like for all the
festivities.
PHIL
Did you ever have deja vu, Mrs.
Lancaster?
MRS. LANCASTER
Is that the Italian dessert with
the brandy and the chocolate
mousse?
PHIL
No, that's spaghetti. Never
mind.
He heads for the door, still in a daze.
MRS. LANCASTER
Oh, will you be checking out
today, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
(vaguely)
I don't know. I don't think so.
I'll tell you after I wake up.
Phil exits.
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-29-

EXT. BOARDING HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Phil gulps down the steaming coffee, still trying to wake up
from what he assumes is a dream, and descends the front steps
of the house. He accosts a PASSERBY.
PHIL
Ma'am? Excuse me. Where's
everybody going?
PASSERBY
To Gobbler's Knob. It's
Groundhog Day!
The coffee cup drops from Phil's hand as he stands there open-
mouthed. Then he slaps his own face and shakes his head as if
trying to clear it and starts off down the street.
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil confronts the Chubby Man and Mrs. Lancaster about the repeating day, realizing he's stuck in a time loop. The encounter with a passerby reveals it's Groundhog Day, leading to Phil's shock and frustration.
Strengths
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Engaging concept
  • Well-defined characters
Weaknesses
  • Limited emotional depth
  • Low stakes
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a strong sense of deja vu, which is a clever way to hint at the time loop that Phil is stuck in. However, the interaction with the Chubby Man feels a bit forced and the dialogue comes off as a bit too aggressive.
  • The transition from the corridor to the breakfast room is a bit abrupt and could be smoother to maintain the flow of the scene.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster about deja vu and the Italian dessert feels a bit disjointed and could be more cohesive to enhance the confusion and disorientation that Phil is experiencing.
  • The scene does a good job of building up the sense of bewilderment and frustration that Phil is feeling, but it could benefit from more subtle cues to indicate the time loop, rather than relying solely on direct dialogue.
  • Overall, the scene effectively sets up the premise of the time loop and Phil's confusion, but could use some fine-tuning in terms of dialogue and pacing.
Suggestions
  • Consider toning down the aggression in Phil's interaction with the Chubby Man to make it more believable and less jarring.
  • Work on creating a smoother transition between the corridor and the breakfast room to maintain the flow of the scene.
  • Refine the dialogue between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster to make it more coherent and engaging, while still conveying Phil's sense of disorientation.
  • Explore more subtle ways to hint at the time loop, such as visual cues or character reactions, to enhance the storytelling.
  • Continue to build on the sense of confusion and frustration that Phil is experiencing, while ensuring the dialogue and pacing are well-balanced.



Scene 10 -  Groundhog Day Deja Vu
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. MAIN STREET - PUNXSUTAWNEY - CONTINUOUS
Phil rushes down the street, again failing to notice the OLD
BUM sitting on the sidewalk leaning against a storefront.
NED RYERSON (O.C.)
Hey, Phil!
Ned Ryerson approaches with the same obnoxious attitude.
NED
Phil! Phil Connors! I thought
that was you!
Phil just stares at him and keeps walking.
NED
My oh my! Phil Connors. Don't
say you don't remember me, 'cause
I sure as heck-fire remember you.
Well?
PHIL
Ned Ryerson?
NED
Bing! First shot right out of
the box. So how's it going, ol'
buddy?
PHIL
To tell you the truth, Neddy, I ' m
not feeling real well. Could you
excuse me?
NED
Now it's funny you should mention
your health 'cause you'll never
guess what I do.
-30-

PHIL
(very distressed and
desperate to get away
from this guy)
Do you sell insurance, Ned?
NED
Bing again! You're sharp as a
tack today. Do you have life
insurance, Phil? 'Cause if you
do, I bet you could use more —
who couldn't?" — but I got a
feeling you don't have any. Am
I right?
PHIL
(really annoyed now)
Did I say "fuck off, " Ned? I
can't talk to you right now.
He backs away from Ned and steps right into the same deep,
slushy puddle he stepped in the day before.
NED
(braying)
Hey, look .out for that first v
step. It's a doozyi
Phil looks down at his wet shoes and cuffs and stumbles off
toward Gobbler's Knob.
CUT TO:

EXT . GOBBLER ' S KNOB - DAWN
The crowd is gathered as before for the big moment.
In the press area, Rita is having the same dialogue with Larry,
when she spots Phil heading into the crowd.
RITA
Here he comes. Phill Hey, Phil!
Over here!
Phil waves to her and heads straight for an obscure corner of
the Knob, gesturing for her to follow.
Larry shakes his head as Rita charges through the crowd toward
Phil. She catches up to him just as he is scratching a mark in
the snow with his foot. She notices immediately that he is
uncharacteristically dishevelled, his tie askew, his hair
mussed.
RITA
Where ' ve you been?
-31-

PHIL
(nervous, sweat ing)
I've got to talk to you. I think
I'm losing my mind.
. RITA
I know you're losing it. What
are you doing over here? The
camera's over there.
PHIL
Slap me, Rita.
RITA
What is this?
PHIL
(insistent)
Just slap me— hard.
She gives up and taps him lightly on the cheek.
PHIL
I said hardl
. . . . ... .RITA .
I can't!
PHIL
Do it!
Rita shrugs and slaps him very hard.
PHIL
(his cheek smarting)
Better. Almost too hard, Rita.
RITA
Are you drunk?
PHIL
No, drunk is more fun. Can I be
serious with you for a minute?
RITA
I don't know. Can you?
PHIL
Yes. I 'm being serious. I' m
having a problem— no, I may be
having a problem.
RITA
What are you trying to say?
-32-

PHIL
I'm trying to say that if I was
having a problem, just
hypothetical ly, I ' d like to know
that you're someone I could count
on in a crisis.
RITA
(worried)
What did you do last night?
The crowd begins to hush.
LARRY
We better get started. We're
going to miss it.
PHIL
Were not going to miss it.
(indicating the other
reporters)
They're going to miss it.
RITA
(emphatic)
Phil. We've been out here for an
hour. We're cold and tired.
Let's just get this and get out
of here.
PHIL
Okay, put it here.
RITA
What?
PHIL
Put the camera here .
Rita takes a forlorn glance towards the press area, where all
of the other cameras are set up .
RITA
Phil , there is no tomorrow on
this one. It's Groundhog Day.
PHIL
We were in the wrong spot
yesterday .
RITA
(irked)
What? Yesterday? What are you
talking about?
PHIL
Just trust me. Put the camera
here .
-33-


Rita looks at him like he's crazy, then looks at her watch and
gives up.
RITA
Larry!
She charges off toward the cameras.
In the Press Area, several reporters are already talking to
their cameras, dribbling on about how "He could appear any
second now." Rita and Larry grab their gear and rush back to
Phil.
Larry hurriedly sets up the camera.
LARRY
You want me to roll tape?
RITA
(to Phil)
Are you going to get on your
mark?
PHIL
No hurry.
Larry glances over at the other news reporters, all talking to
their cameras and pointing towards the mound.
LARRY
(desperately)
Everyone else is rolling!
Rita looks helplessly at Phil.
RITA
I'm begging you, all right?
Gould we please just do this?
Phil glances down at his watch.
PHIL
Okay, let's do it.
He crosses over to Larry and taps him on the shoulder.
PHIL
Roll tape.
LARRY
(mumbling)
Prima donnas.
Phil takes the microphone from Rita and positions himself
against the fence.
LARRY
Rolling.
-34-

Phil does a similar intro to the one he did before, though this
time it's a bit tentative.
PHIL
(to camera)
Well, it's Groundhog Day— again—
and you know what that means.
Everybody's here on Gobbler's
Knob waiting in the cold for the
appearance of the most famous
groundhog in the world,
Punxsutawney Phil, who's going to
tell us just how much more of
this we can expect.
The Groundhog Club Official knocks on the groundhog's door,
then opens it and retreats.
Phil takes a deep breath and makes his first experimental
prediction, recalling the previous day.
PHIL
My forecast is we're going to see
the groundhog peek its head out
of its hole, look around a little
bit, then he's going to come out,
scamper over to this general
area, look at the crowd for a
second, make a little burping
noise and run back into the
ground.
RITA
(whispers to Larry)
That's it. I'm going to kill
him.
Phil looks at his watch.
PHIL
Okay? And here we go—
Phil points to the hole and Larry zooms in.
The groundhog sticks his head out, looks left, looks right,
steps out of the hole, and runs away from the press pool,
directly over to Larry's camera. As he stands there, his body
casts a long shadow. The groundhog looks right into the
camera, lets out a squeak, and runs back into the hole.
Rita and Larry are completely amazed as the crowd cheers the
brief appearance of the groundhog. Larry pans back to Phil.
Phil just stands there speechless, staring at the groundhog
burrow.
-35-

RITA
(hisses)
Phil!
Buster Greene, the Groundhog club official, walks onto the
mound and hushes the crowd, exactly as before.
BUSTER
He came out, and he saw his
shadow. Sorry, ladies and
gentlemen, but it looks like it's
going to be a long winter.
Again the crowd lets out a good-natured "Awwwwww" in
disappointment.
Larry pans back to Phil just in time to see him walking away in
a fog, without signing off. Then he pans back to Rita.
RITA
(at a loss)
For Channel 9 News, this is Rita
Hanson in Punxsutawney.
She holds for a moment then makes the cut sign, drawing her
finger across her throat.
CUT TO:

INT; PHIL'S ROOM - LATER
Phil is on the phone desperately trying to make a call.
PHIL
(on the phone)
I know there's a blizzard, but I
have to get a call through to my
doctor in Pittsburgh. It's a
medical emergency. . . .No, don't
give me the Punxsutawney Fire
Department. When do you think
the long distance lines will be
working again?. . . But what if we
don't have a tomorrow? We didn't
have one today, my friend...
Hello...Hello?
He hangs up and shakes his head which is now really starting to
ache, then he pops a handful of Tylenol, lies down and pulls
the covers up over his head. A moment later, he sits up, takes
a pencil from the nightstand, breaks it in half and puts the
pieces back on the nightstand. Then he lies back down and
retreats back under the covers.
CUT TO:
-36-
CLOSE UP - CLOCK
The digital clock-radio changes from 5:59 to 6:00 AM. The
radio comes on, playing the end of the Sonny and Cher hit, "I
Got You, Babe," just as it did the day before.
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil Connors, a weatherman, is stuck in a time loop on Groundhog Day. He encounters Ned Ryerson, an annoying insurance salesman, and Rita Hanson, a producer for Channel 9 News. Phil tries to warn Rita about the groundhog prediction, but she ignores him. Phil also tries to get away from Ned, but he is persistent. The scene ends with Phil lying down in bed, frustrated and annoyed.
Strengths
  • Engaging premise
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive elements
  • Limited emotional depth
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear focus and purpose, leading to a disjointed narrative that jumps between different interactions and events without a cohesive thread.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Ned Ryerson feels forced and lacks depth, failing to establish a meaningful interaction between the characters.
  • Phil's behavior towards Rita is erratic and confusing, making it difficult for the audience to understand his motivations and emotional state.
  • The pacing of the scene is uneven, with abrupt shifts in tone and mood that disrupt the flow of the story.
  • The resolution of the scene, with Phil's failed prediction and subsequent confusion, feels anticlimactic and leaves the audience unsatisfied.
Suggestions
  • Clarify the central conflict or goal of the scene to provide a clear direction for the characters and storyline.
  • Develop the interaction between Phil and Ned Ryerson to add depth and meaning to their encounter.
  • Focus on building a more consistent and believable emotional arc for Phil, especially in his interactions with Rita.
  • Smooth out the pacing of the scene by creating a more gradual build-up towards the climax and resolution.
  • Consider revising the ending to provide a more satisfying and impactful conclusion to the scene.



Scene 11 -  Phil's Destructive Rage
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
INT. PHIL'S ROOM - DAWN
Phil sits up in bed fearing the worst and looks on the
nightstand. The pencil is whole again. Completely stunned by
the phenomenon, he jumps out of bed and starts dressing
hurriedly as the morning Deejays begin their now familiar rap.
DEEJAY
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's COOOLD out there
today!
SIDEKICK
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this— Miami Beach?
Phil rushes out of the room.
CUT TO:

EXT. CHERRY STREET - LATER
Phil hurries toward the bed and breakfast carrying two gallon
buckets of paint, and a couple of big bags from a hardware
store.

INT. BED AND BREAKFAST - CONTINUOUS
Phil enters and passes Mrs. Lancaster in the breakfast room.
MRS. LANCASTER
Painting something, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
I ' m conducting an experiment.

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - LATER
Phil enters and dumps the bags on the bed. Out fall a couple
of big paintbrushes, a small sledgehammer, a handsaw, a
crowbar, plastic goggles and assorted other tools. He puts on
the goggles, grabs a hammer and some nails and starts nailing
the door shut.
CUT TO:
-37-

EXT. CORRIDOR - LATER
Mrs. Lancaster and several other guests are gathered in the
hall outside Phil's room, listening at the door and looking
very worried. Loud music is playing inside the room.
From inside the room, they hear the sound of loud hammering,
wood splintering and glass breaking.

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil, has demolished just about all the furniture and woodwork
in the room. He rips off the last of the wooden moldings with
the crowbar, then crosses to the mirror over the demolished
sink.
Phil stands there, staring at his image in the mirror, trying
to figure out what's happening to him. He starts breathing
heavier, as if gathering courage, then, just when we think he's
going to cut off his ear or something, he raises an electric
barber clipper and shaves a bald stripe up the middle of his
head. He studies his new look for a moment then smashes the
mirror with his sledgehammer.
Then he opens the cans of paint, dips the two big brushes into
the cans and starts slapping bright red paint onto the walls,
madly, feverishly, splashing himself and everything else in the
room with it.
As a final touch he grabs the bed pillows and rips them open,
then shakes them all around the room creating a storm of
feathers.
Finally, Phil falls exhausted on the bed. From outside we can
hear outraged hotel employees pounding on the door.
We pan over to the clock radio, the only undamaged object in
the room. Feathers drift down past the face of the clock which
reads 5:59 AM. The time changes to 6:00, the radio clicks on
and "I Got You, Babe" starts playing as we pan back to Phil
sleeping on the bed.
He opens his eyes, jumps out of bed and looks around. No
paint, no feathers, no damage. Everything is as clean and tidy
as the day he checked in.
He races over to the unbroken mirror and looks at himself. His
hair is completely restored, as if it had never been shaved.
The song ends and the deejays come on. Phil says every word
right along with them, shocked into a state of complete
wonderment.
-38-

PHIL AND DEEJAY
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's COOOLD out there
today.
PHIL AND SIDEKICK
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this — Miami Beach?
The deejay laughs. Phil laughs insanely along with him.
CUT TO:

EXT . GOBBLER ' S KNOB - EARLY MORNING
Phil is wrapping up another groundhog report, trying to be
completely professional despite the circumstances.
PHIL
(with forced good
humor)
. . . S o according to Mr. Groundhog
I guess we can expect six more
weeks of winter. It's not very
scientific, but it sure is fun.
Hey, wait a second. If he's
right, I could be out of a job!
(mock laugh)
For Channel 9 News, this is Phil
Connors in Punxsutawney .
He holds until Larry stops tape, then approaches Rita.
PHIL
How was that?
RITA
(pleased)
It was good. A little smarmy for
my taste, but I guess that's what
sells.
PHIL
Could I talk to you about a
matter that is not work related?
RITA
You never talk about work.
PHIL
Do you know what I did last
night?
RITA
Do I want to know?
-39-

PHIL
I destroyed my hotel room.
RITA
You whatl This is not some kind
of rock and roll tour. We don't
have the budget for that—
PHIL
No, it's okay. This morning it
was all right again. That's what
I have to talk to you about.
RITA
Phil, what are you doing?
CUT TO:

EXT. MAIN STREET - A BIT LATER
Phil and Rita cross the street and walk past a crowd of
concerned citizens gathered around what looks like a car
accident. As an ambulance arrives, Phil and Rita enter the
cozy looking diner on the corner.
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Romance"]

Summary Discovering his room undamaged, Phil rampages, destroying furniture, painting walls red, and shaving his head. He unleashes a feather storm before collapsing on the bed, exhausted. Upon waking, the room is miraculously restored, and his hair is revived.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Strong character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Moderate conflict level
  • Relatively low stakes
Critique
  • The scene starts with a dramatic and chaotic sequence of Phil destroying his room, which may come across as too extreme and out of character for Phil at this point in the story.
  • The transition from Phil destroying his room to the radio playing 'I Got You, Babe' and the day resetting feels abrupt and disjointed, lacking a smooth connection between the two events.
  • The scene could benefit from more clarity on Phil's emotional state and motivations for his actions, as well as a deeper exploration of his realization of being stuck in a time loop.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster could be more impactful and revealing of Phil's inner turmoil, adding depth to his character development.
  • The visual elements of the scene, such as the destruction of the room and the feathers flying around, could be toned down to better match the tone and pacing of the overall story.
Suggestions
  • Consider toning down the extreme actions of Phil in destroying his room to make it more believable and in line with his character development.
  • Work on creating a smoother transition between the chaotic destruction of the room and the moment of realization for Phil about the time loop.
  • Focus on developing Phil's emotional journey and inner conflict more deeply to engage the audience and create a more compelling narrative.
  • Revise the dialogue between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster to add more depth and insight into Phil's mindset and struggles.
  • Adjust the visual elements of the scene to better match the overall tone and pacing of the screenplay, ensuring they enhance the storytelling rather than distract from it.



Scene 12 -  Groundhog Day Dilemma
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. DINER.- CONTINUOUS
Phil and Rita sit together at the same table they had
previously. The WAITER approaches.
RITA
(to waiter)
Could I have some coffee, please?
The waiter pours her a cup.
WAITER
(exiting)
I'll be back to take your order.
RITA
Thanks.
(to Phil)
Okay, so tell me. How'd you know
where to put the camera?
PHIL
Because I've done it before.
RITA
I know, but the groundhog doesn't
do exactly the same thing every
year, does he?
-40-

PHIL
I ' m not talking about last year.
I ' m talking about today. I lived
it before.
RITA
You're having deja vu?
PHIL
Big time. Rita, I know it's nuts
but I keep reliving the same day
over and over— Groundhog Day—
today. This is the third time.
RITA
(completely skeptical)
Uh-huh. I'm waiting for the
punchline.
PHIL
No, really. It's like today
never happened. I shaved my head
last night, today its all grown
back. I could probably cut off
my limbs, one by one, and - pop!
They'd grow back. Just like a
starfish. I probably don't even
have to floss?
RITA
I'm wracking my brain, but I
can't even begin to imagine why
you'd make up something like
this.
PHIL
'Cause I'm not making it up. I'm
asking for your help.
Rita looks at him for a long moment.
RITA
Okay, I'll bite. What do you
want me to do?
PHIL
The truth? I'd 1ike you to spend
the next 24 hours with me and
don't leave my side for a second.
RITA
I see. You know, Phil, you can
charm all the little P.A.'s at
the station, all the secretaries,
and even some of the weekend
anchors, but not me— not in a
thousand years.
-41-

PHIL
Wait a second—
RITA
Not if I was dying and your
breath was the only cure; not if
having your child was the only
way to preserve the human race.
Just get it out of your head
because it is NOT GOING TO
HAPPEN!
PHIL
So much for the truth.
Larry pokes his head in the doorway, looks around, spots Rita
and makes his way over to their table.
LARRY
(to Rita)
You ready? We better get going
if we're going to stay ahead of
the weather.
RITA
Yeah, , I ' m . ready, Larry.
(exiting)
Good luck, Phil.
CUT TO:
INSERT
X-rays of Phil's skull are slapped up onto a light box.

INT. MEDICAL CLINIC - DAY
Phil is having his head examined by a NEUROLOGIST.
NEUROLOGIST
No spots, no tumors, no lesions,
no clots, no aneurisms.
Everything looks fine and dandy
to me, Mr. Connors. Have you
considered psychiatric help?
CUT TO:

INT. PSYCHOLOGIST'S OFFICE - DAY
Punxsutawney's only PSYCHOLOGIST is a marriage and family
counselor at the local Lutheran church. His appearance and
manner indicate he may have some serious problems of his own.
-42-

PSYCHOLOGIST
(not too confident)
That's kind of an unusual
problem, Mr. Connors. Most of my
work is with couples and
families.
Phil is lying on a couch. His head is completely shaved.
PHIL
Yeah, but you're still a
psychologist. You must have had
some course in school that
covered this kind of thing.
PSYCHOLOGIST
Sort of, I guess. Abnormal
Psychology.
PHIL
So based on that what would you
say?
PSYCHOLOGIST
(hesitant)
I ' d say that maybe you're — I
don't know* — a little delusional.
PHIL
You're saying this thing is not
really happening to me?
PSYCHOLOGIST
Uh-huh.
PHIL
Then how do I know this
conversation is really happening?
PSYCHOLOGIST
I guess you don't.
PHIL
Then forget about me paying you.
A discreet little alarm sounds.
PSYCHOLOGIST
(relieved)
I'm afraid that's all the time we
have, Mr. Connors.
PHIL
Wait! Are you saying I'm crazy?
-43-

PSYCHOLOGIST
(humoring him)
Not necessarily. If it concerns
you we should schedule our next
session as soon as possible.
How's tomorrow for you?
Phil glowers at him.
CUT TO:
INSERT - A MODEL OF THE SOLAR SYSTEM
A SCIENTIST in a white lab coat is holding up the model. Phil
looks on with interest.
SCIENTIST
(authoritatively)
Now if the moon exerts a
gravitational pull strong enough
to cause the tides, .then it may
be theoretically possible for a
Black Hole or a Singularity of
sufficient magnitude to actually
bend time enough to cause it to
fold back ,on itself.
PHIL
You think that's a realistic
possibility?
A paper airplane sails past his head, accompanied by a noisy
outburst of juvenile laughter. We pull back to REVEAL:
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Romance"]

Summary Phil's relentless pursuit to prove his time loop theory meets Rita's skepticism. Despite seeking professional opinions and exploring scientific possibilities, Phil's efforts to convince Rita for assistance fail, leaving him to continue his quest alone.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Intriguing concept
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive elements
  • Slightly predictable plot progression
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition from the previous scene, making it feel disjointed.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels a bit forced and lacks depth in exploring the emotional impact of Phil's situation.
  • The interaction between Phil and the medical professionals feels rushed and lacks believability in terms of their responses to Phil's claims.
  • The scene introduces the scientist discussing time folding back on itself, but this concept is not fully explored or integrated into the rest of the scene.
  • The humor in the psychologist's response to Phil's concerns feels out of place and detracts from the seriousness of the situation Phil is facing.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scene to this one to maintain continuity.
  • Focus on developing a more emotional and impactful conversation between Phil and Rita to delve deeper into the implications of Phil's time loop.
  • Provide more realistic and nuanced responses from the medical professionals to enhance the credibility of Phil's situation.
  • Integrate the concept of time folding back on itself more effectively into the scene to add depth and intrigue.
  • Adjust the tone of the psychologist's interaction with Phil to better align with the seriousness of the situation Phil is experiencing.



Scene 13 -  Reckless Abandon
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
INT. CLASSROOM - DAY
Twenty-five eighth-graders running amok.
SCIENTIST
(sternly)
All right! I think someone may
just need a little visit to the
Assistant Principal's office!
Get back in your seats. The bell
has not rung yet.
The kids sit back down, but keep up their noisy chatter.
SCIENTIST
(to Phil)
Well, I ' m speaking purely
hypothetically.
CUT TO:
-44-

INT. SCHOOL CORRIDOR - LATER
Phil is walking toward the exit when he passes a first grade
classroom. The door is open and the TEACHER is discussing a
story with the class.
TEACHER
So the princess picked up the
frog and kissed him.
Phil stops outside the door to listen.

INT. CLASSROOM - CONTINUOUS
TEACHER
Now who can tell me what happened
when the princess kissed the
frog.
LITTLE BOY
Her lips got slimed!
The whole class erupts in giggles and shrieks.
TEACHER
Okay, come on now. What happened
when she kissed the frog?
LITTLE GIRL
The princess kissed the frog and
the spell got broke and he turned
into a handsome prince and they
got married and lived happily
ever after.
TEACHER
That's right.

INT. THE CORRIDOR - SAME TIME
Phil is leaning against the wall listening. There is something
very arresting about the fairy tale, but finally he just shakes
his head and exits.
CUT TO:

INT. DEW DROP INN - LATER THAT NIGHT
Phil is at a bar getting drunk with two local blue-collar
workers, GUS and PHIL.
PHIL
Gus, what would you do if there
was no tomorrow?
-45-

GUS
You mean like if the world was
gonna end?
PHIL
No, I mean like if it was never
going to end. If everyday was
the same and you were stuck here
and you couldn't get out and
nothing you did mattered?
GUS
You're right. Everyday is the
same, I can't get out of here and
nothin' I do matters.
V RALPH
No, he's askin1 you a question,
ya idiot.
GUS
What was the question?
RALPH
What if nothing mattered?! Jeez,
I know what I'd do. I ' d j ust
spend all my time drivin' fast,
gettin1 loaded and gettin' laid.
That's it.
PHIL
That's it. It just doesn't get
any better than this, does it?
Good friends, good conversation
and quality brew. Drink up,
boys.
They salute each other and drink.
CUT TO:

EXT. THE STREET - LATER
Phil, Gus and Ralph approach Ralph's big, black, old Buick
convertible parked outside the bar. They are even drunker than
they were before.
RALPH
(fumbling with his
carkeys)
Where you stayin', Phil? We'll
drop you off.
PHIL
Hey, friends don't let friends
drive drunk. Give me your keys.
-46-

He's as wasted as they are, but Ralph hands over his keys
without a fight.
RALPH
Thanks , man .
PHIL
It's nothing. Get in.
They all pile into the front seat with Phil at the wheel.
PHIL
(starting the ear)
Seatbelts.
Ralph and Gus give him the thumbs up sign and start digging
around in the seat cracks for their seatbelts. Suddenly, Phil
floors the accelerator and peels away, sideswiping a parked car
as he screeches around the corner.

INT. THE BUICK - CONTINUOUS
Phil is having a great time. Gus and Ralph are whooping it up
like kids on a roller coaster.
PHIL
This is great, Ralph!
RALPH
Oh, hey, take a left!
Phil passes the intersection.
RALPH
You missed it!
PHIL
No problem —

EXT . MAIN STREET - CONTINUOUS
Phil throws the car into a high-speed, skidding U-turn, goes up
on the curb, across a couple of lawns, takes out a mailbox and
a STOP sign and bounces back onto the street.
A POLICE CAR parked in front of the hardware store pulls out
and takes off after him.

INT. THE BUICK - CONTINUOUS
Phil swerves in and out of oncoming traffic. Gus is starting
to look a little green.
PHIL
So many rules —
-47-

RALPH
You can say that again.
PHIL
"Don't do this—"

EXT. THE STREET - CONTINUOUS
The Buick demolishes a parked car.
PHIL (V.O.)
"Don't do that — "
He mows down a row of parking meters.
POLICE CAR
It comes screaming around a corner in hot pursuit of the Buick

INT. THE BUICK - CONTINUOUS
Ralph hears the siren and looks back at the police car.

All right! Try and stop us, you
mothers !
PHIL
No more rules!
RALPH
No more rules!
Genres: ["Drama","Comedy"]

Summary Phil, Gus, and Ralph question life's meaning and societal expectations at a bar. Intoxicated, they embark on a dangerous drive, defying rules and evading the police, embracing a carefree and reckless lifestyle.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Tension-filled action
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Potential for promoting reckless behavior
  • Lack of significant character growth
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear connection to the overall theme of the screenplay, which revolves around Phil reliving Groundhog Day and his personal growth.
  • The dialogue between Phil, Gus, and Ralph feels forced and lacks depth. The conversation about the meaning of life and breaking societal norms comes off as cliched and superficial.
  • The scene portrays reckless and dangerous behavior, which may not align with the character development and tone established in previous scenes.
  • The transition from the classroom setting to the bar scene feels abrupt and disjointed, making it difficult for the audience to follow the narrative flow.
  • The scene lacks emotional depth and fails to engage the audience in a meaningful way.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising the dialogue to make it more meaningful and reflective of the characters' internal struggles and growth.
  • Connect the scene more closely to Phil's journey of self-discovery and personal transformation throughout the screenplay.
  • Explore more nuanced and authentic ways for Phil to grapple with the concept of living the same day over and over again.
  • Ensure that the actions and decisions of the characters align with their established personalities and the overall tone of the screenplay.
  • Work on creating a smoother transition between scenes to maintain the coherence and flow of the narrative.



Scene 14 -  Phil's Time Loop Begins
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. THE STREET - CONTINUOUS
A second police car joins the chase.
RALPH
(looking back)
That's two!
PHIL
Having a good time?
RALPH
I'm having a great time!
Phil speeds up to a hundred miles and hour. Gus is looking
even worse from the liquor and the motion of the car.
GUS
Hey, uh —
PHIL
Phil.
-48-

GUS
Yeah, Phil— like the groundhog.
PHIL
Right.
GUS
Hey, Phil? How're we going to
get out of this?
THEIR POV - THE INTERSECTION AHEAD
Two police cars with lights flashing are parked sideways,
completely blocking the road. Officers stand in the roadway,
motioning for Phil to stop.
PHIL
(calmly)
Gus, you're just going to have to
trust me on this one.
He tromps the gas pedal to the floor. Gus's eyes go wide with
terror.
The police dive out of the way.
PHIL AND RALPH
Yahooooo!
THEIR POV - THROUGH THE WINDSHIELD
The Buick crashes head on into one of the police cars.
BLACK OUT:
CLOSE UP - CLOCK
The time changes from 5:59 to 6:00. The radio starts playing
"I Got You, Babe."
Phil sits up suddenly and looks around, completely amazed. He
is in his room at the bed and breakfast, everything exactly the
same as before. He hops out of bed and quickly examines
himself for signs of physical injury. Nothing. The music ends
and the two deej ays come on.
DEEJAY
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's COOOLD out there
today.
Phil talks out loud along with them.
PHIL AND SIDEKICK
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this— Miami Beach?
-49-

The deejays laughs. Phil laughs, too, exhilirated at having
survived the car wreck, still very confused and perplexed, but
just beginning to see the possibilities of his unique
situation. He starts dressing in a hurry.
CUT TO:

INT. BREAKFAST ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil rushes into the breakfast room just as Mrs. Lancaster
comes out of the kitchen with the coffee. Everything is
exactly the same as before.
MRS. LANCASTER
Would you—
Phil interrupts, answering all her questions before she even
asks them.
PHIL
(urgently)
Yes, I would like some coffee;
the weather is going to be cold
and overcast with blizzard
conditions moving in later today;
and yes, I will be staying an
extra day.
MRS. LANCASTER
(baffled)
Why thank you.
PHIL
Mrs. Lancaster, has anyone been
around here looking for me this
morning? Maybe a state official,
blue coat, hat, gun, nightstick,
badge, driving a late-model Ford
br Chevy, black and white with
bubble lights on top—
MRS. LANCASTER
(shocked)
No, no one like that-- I .don't—
Will they be?
PHIL
(greatly relieved)
Apparently not.
Phil gooses her, grabs a sweet roll, and heads for the door,
starting to believe now that he can truly do anything he wants
to.
CUT TO:
-50-

EXT. BOARDING HOUSE - DAWN
Phil stops on the steps, puts on his coat and gloves and again
joins the traffic heading toward Gobbler's Knob.

EXT. MAIN STREET - MOMENTS LATER
Phil passes the old bum, ignoring him as usual.
NED (O.C.)
Hey, Phil!
Phil slips off his glove as Ned Ryerson lumbers toward him.
NED
Phil! Phil Connors!
PHIL
Ned! Ned Ryerson! Ned the Head!
Before Ned can say another word, Phil SLUGS HIM. Ned goes
down, Phil puts his glove back on and keeps walking.
Phil deftly avoids the slushy pothole he stepped in before. A
PEDESTRIAN walking behind him steps right into it.
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - LATER
Phil is passing through the crowd on his way to the press area
when he notices NANCY, the girl he met at the hotel bar, and
stops to talk to her.
PHIL
You here to see the groundhog?
She gives him a look. It's obvious she's never seen him
before.
NANCY
Can you think of another reason
anybody'd be out here at dawn on
a freezing day?
PHIL
What's your name?
NANCY
Nancy Taylor. And you are—

PHIL
Where'd you go to high school?
-51-

NANCY
What is this?
PHIL
(playful)
High school?
She really doesn't know what to make of Phil but she decides to
play along.
NANCY
Lincoln High school. In
Pittsburgh. Who are you?
PHIL
Who was your twelfth grade
English teacher?
NANCY
Are you kidding?
PHIL
I'm waiting.
NANCY
.Mrs. Walsh.
PHIL
Walsh. Nancy, Lincoln, Walsh.
NANCY
Is this some kind of come-on?
PHIL
I'm not really sure. We'll have
to see.
Phil walks off and joins Rita at their camera position.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil, caught in a time loop, awakens to a car chase and crash. Realizing his situation, he interacts with Mrs. Lancaster and Nancy, displaying a playful demeanor. Despite Mrs. Lancaster's confusion, Phil embraces his freedom, navigating Punxsutawney with a newfound perspective.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Well-developed characters
  • Humorous dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may feel repetitive due to the time loop premise
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a chaotic car chase that ends in a crash, which may be too abrupt and jarring for the audience.
  • The dialogue between Phil, Gus, and Ralph during the car chase feels a bit forced and lacks depth, making it difficult for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The transition from the car crash back to Phil waking up in his room is a bit disjointed and could be smoother to maintain the flow of the story.
  • The interaction between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster in the breakfast room feels rushed and lacks depth, missing an opportunity to further explore Phil's character development.
  • The sudden appearance of Ned Ryerson and Phil punching him without much context or buildup may confuse the audience and disrupt the narrative flow.
Suggestions
  • Consider restructuring the car chase scene to build more tension and suspense, leading to a more impactful crash.
  • Develop the dialogue between Phil, Gus, and Ralph to reveal more about their characters and motivations, making the scene more engaging for the audience.
  • Smooth out the transition between the car crash and Phil waking up in his room to maintain continuity and coherence in the storytelling.
  • Expand the interaction between Phil and Mrs. Lancaster to delve deeper into Phil's mindset and emotions after the car crash, adding layers to his character.
  • Introduce Ned Ryerson in a more organic way that aligns with the overall narrative, providing context for Phil's reaction and creating a more seamless storyline.



Scene 15 -  Breakfast and Beyond
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 9
INT. DINER - LATER THAT MORNING
Phil is sitting at his usual table, which is covered with an
incredible variety of rich foods— eggs, bacon, sausage,
pancakes, pies, cakes, eclairs, ice cream, puddings, etc.
Rita sits across from him, watching in amazement as he stuffs
himself with pastry.
RITA
Is this some new fad diet? Don't
you worry about cholesterol?
Phil scrapes a plate and takes a final bite of a chocolate
eclair.
-52-

PHIL
I don't worry about anything
anymore.
RITA
What makes you so special?
Everybody worries about
something.
PHIL
That's exactly what makes me so
special.
He takes a big bite of cake. Rita shakes her head.
PHIL
(with his mouth full)
What?
RITA
"The wretch, concentered all
in self,
Living, shall forfeit fair
renown,
And doubly dying, shall go
down to the vile dust from
whence he sprung,
Unwept, unhonored, and
unsung." Sir Walter Scott.
PHIL
(stares at her for a
long moment)
"There was a young man from
Nantucket—"
RITA
That's really funny. When are
you going to grow up, Phil?
PHIL
At this rate-- never.
(he pulls out a pack of
cigarettes)
Okay if I smoke?
Rita shrugs. Phil lights up a cigarette.
RITA
You really do have a death wish,
don't you?
PHIL
Just the opposite, Rita. I have
a life wish. I'm just trying to
enjoy it. Taking pleasure in the
little things. Don't you ever
just want to cut loose and go
wild?
-53-

RITA
I wouldn't even know what it
means to go wild.
PHIL
Yeah, well, that's where I come
in. Going wild is one of my
specialties. Last night I got
completely loaded and drove head-
on into a police car.
RITA
(disbelieving)
Oh, really? You look pretty good
this morning.
PHIL
That's my point. I know you
won't believe me, but we could do
anything we want today and it
wouldn't matter one bit.
Absolutely no consequences.
Complete and total freedom.
RITA
And how. .,do we manage that?
PHIL
You leave that to me. Why don't
you send Larry back and hang out
with me for the rest of the day?
You never make it through that
blizzard anyway.
Larry enters the diner and spots them.
RITA
I'll take my chances with the
-weather. But you have a good
time.
PHIL
Don't worry. I plan to.
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - NEXT MORNING
Phil comes through the crowd and finds Nancy in the same spot
she was in the day before.
PHIL
Nancy?
Nancy turns and looks at him quizzically.
-54-

PHIL
Nancy, right?
NANCY
I'm sorry, I—
PHIL
Nancy Taylor? Lincoln High? I
sat next to you in Mrs. Walsh's
English class.
NANCY
That—
PHIL
Phil Connors.
NANCY
--is amazing!
PHIL
You don't remember me, do you?
NANCY
I don't— sure, I think—
PHIL
We used to shoot spit balls—
NANCY
Yeah, oh, God—
PHIL
I even asked you to the prom.
NANCY
Phil Connors.
PHIL
Yeah.
NANCY
How ARE you?!
PHIL
I ' m great. Wow, you look
terrific. Hey, listen, I gotta
do this report—
NANCY
You're a reporter?
PHIL
Weatherman. Channel 9,
Pittsburgh.
NANCY
Right, I should've known—
-55-

PHIL
But maybe after we could —
NANCY
Yeah, yeah, I ' d like that —
RITA (O.C.)
Phil!
Rita is calling from across the crowd. She looks at him with
disapproval .
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INT. PHIL'S ROOM - NIGHT
Phil is making passionate love to a WOMAN in the dark.
WOMAN
(moans)
Oh, Phil.
PHIL
Oh , Rita .
The woman suddenly freezes. There is a moment of silence, then
she snaps on the light. It's Nancy, not Rita. Phil is as
surprised as she is by his slip of the tongue.
NANCY
(cold)
Who's Rita?
PHIL
(caught)
No one. It's just something I
say when I make love. You know —
"Orita", "Orighta"-- it's like
"Oh, baby" or something.
NANCY
(not entirely
convinced)
Oh.
PHIL
(corrects her)
O-rita.
Nancy laughs uncertainly. Phil switches off the light,
thinking now about Rita.
CUT TO:
-56-
Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil indulges in breakfast and philosophy, Rita disapproves. Phil finds a familiar face at Gobbler's Knob.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Exploration of themes
  • Character interactions
Weaknesses
  • Lack of high stakes
  • Some cliched moments
Critique
  • The scene starts with Phil indulging in a large breakfast, which could be seen as a metaphor for his carefree and reckless attitude towards life. This could be further emphasized by showing Rita's reaction to his behavior more explicitly.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita lacks depth and emotional resonance, making their interaction feel superficial. There is a missed opportunity to delve into the complexities of their characters and their evolving relationship.
  • Phil's attempt to convince Rita to join him in his wild and consequence-free day feels forced and lacks authenticity. The transition from discussing a serious quote to Phil's lighthearted response with a limerick feels abrupt and disconnected.
  • The introduction of Nancy in the scene adds an interesting dynamic, but the interaction between Phil and Nancy could be more nuanced and meaningful. Phil's slip of the tongue with Rita's name could be explored further to create tension and intrigue.
  • The scene ends with a sudden shift to Phil making love to a woman, which feels out of place and disconnected from the rest of the scene. The reveal that it's Nancy instead of Rita lacks impact and resolution.
Suggestions
  • Focus on developing the emotional depth and authenticity of the dialogue between Phil and Rita to make their interaction more engaging and meaningful.
  • Explore the dynamics between Phil, Rita, and Nancy in a more nuanced way to create tension and intrigue in the scene.
  • Consider revising the transition between the light-hearted breakfast conversation and the more serious topic of Phil's desire for a consequence-free day to create a smoother flow.
  • Build up the tension and resolution of Phil's slip of the tongue with Rita's name to add depth to his character and relationships.
  • Reevaluate the inclusion of the intimate scene with Nancy to ensure it aligns with the overall tone and narrative of the screenplay.



Scene 16 -  Phil's Adventures
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 7
INT. BREAKFAST ROOM - MORNING
Some elderly GUESTS are sipping coffee and eating breakfast,
staring uncomfortably at something on the other side of the
room.
THEIR POV
Phil is standing at the bookcase, wearing only pajamas,
absently munching on a Danish as he reads from one of the
books.
Mrs. Lancaster approaches him.
MRS. LANCASTER
Isn't it a wonderful collection?
PHIL
(not looking up)
Yes, it is. You don't usually
find this many trashy novels in
one place.
MRS. LANCASTER
You can take a book up to your
room if you like.
PHIL
No, thank you. I've actually
read them all. I was just
rereading some of the dirty
parts.
He finishes and puts the book back on the shelf.
MRS. LANCASTER
(worried)
How long will you be staying with
us, Mr. Connors?
PHIL
Indefinitely. I've already been
here for 211 days.
MRS. LANCASTER
(humoring him)
Really? That's quite a long
time, isn't it. I hope you're
finding things to do in our
little town.
PHIL
(casually)
Yes, well, I'm getting a little
tired of casual sex so today I
thought I'd rob a bank and buy
myself a really expensive car.
-57-

Phil kisses her on the lips and walks off.
CUT TO:
EXT. PENN BANK AND TRUST - DAY
Two harmless-looking old GUARDS are calmly loading bags of cash
into an armored car parked in front of a local bank. Suddenly
Phil appears, wielding a shotgun, wearing a Batman style cape,
his face completely hidden by a ski mask.
PHIL
(shouts)
All right, freeze!! Drop your
guns J!
The guards stand there frozen with terror.
PHIL
You guys ever been held up
before?
(they shake their
heads)
It's kind of exciting, isn't it?
FIRST GUARD
(frightened)
I guess so. Something to tell
the kids about.
PHIL
Yeah. By the way, I'm Phil.
He raises the mask and shows his face.
FIRST GUARD
Herman.
SECOND GUARD
Felix.
PHIL
(shaking their hands)
Herman and Felix. Okay. Take it
easy, boys. And thanks.
The frightened guards watch as Phil makes off with two large
satchels of cash.
CUT TO:
INT. USED CAR DEALERSHIP - DAY
Phil pats the hood of a used BMW 850 sports car as a SALESMAN
stands by beaming. Phil is wearing a full Steelers football
uniform complete with shoulder pads.
-58-

SALESMAN
A real beauty, huh. We picked it
up at a—
PHIL
I'll take it. How much?
SALESMAN
Well, the sticker says $62,999
but if you want—
PHIL
I'll tell you what. I'll give
you $70,000 if you just knock off
the car salesman stuff and let me
get out of here with my car.
The Salesman gawks as Phil opens his briefcase and starts
counting out stacks of bills.
CUT TO:

EXT. PUNXSUTAWNEY - DAY
From a high angle, we see the BMW tearing around the streets of
the town as if running a Grand Prix road race.
CUT TO:

EXT. MAIN STREET - DAY
The BMW comes screeching to a stop right in front of the movie
theater and the door opens.
A pair of really elaborate cowboy boots complete with silver
spurs hits the pavement first; then we PAN UP to see Phil
emerge from the car wearing a really gaudy; full cowboy outfit
with real six-guns on his hips. A very trashy-looking girl,
LARAINE, gets out on the passenger side, dressed like a French
maid.
LARAINE
(very self-conscious)
I thought we were going to a
costume party.
PHIL
Yeah, we are, we are. But first
I have this movie theater fantasy
I want to talk to you about.
He escorts her into the theater.
CUT TO:
-59-

INT. TATTOO PARLOR - ANOTHER DAY
Phil is lying on the table, getting elaborately tattooed.
Rita walks by, looks in the window and is shocked to see Phil
there.
Phil waves at her and points to the colorful new heart pierced
by a bloody dagger being tattooed on his arm.
CUT TO:

INT. BIKER BAR - NIGHT
We pan down the line of ROUGH TRADE PATRONS to. Phil, dressed
all in black leathers, both arms heavily tattooed, looking like
Sid Viscious on crack. He takes off his hat to reveal red,
white and blue hair shaved almost down to his skull. A slut
named ANGIE and another overweight, not very pretty MADONNA
WANNA-BE, both in too-tight jeans and bullet bras are coming on
to him, practically licking his ears. Angie pops a couple of
mystery pills into his mouth. Phil washes them down with a
shot and a beer.
i
CUT TO:

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - NIGHT
It looks like ;outtakes from Fellini's "Satyricon." Heavy metal
is blaring from the radio, as several unsavory looking men and
women are partying down, a few already passed out, sleeping off
whatever hit them. Someone is knocking loudly on the door,
shouting complaints about the music. A beer bottle smashes
against the door.
Phil is sitting up on the bed with Angie. He has his arm
around her shoulder and a fifth of Wild Turkey in his hand.
PHIL
(more to himself than
to Angie)
Yeah, but eventually you' d just
get tired of screwing around and
then you'd want a real
relationship, wouldn't you?
ANGIE
I don't know.
A big German Shepherd tries to jump up on the bed with them.
PHIL
Get down, Brunoi
(continuing)
Someone decent, someone who you
respected, who respects you.
-60-


ANGIE
I guess so.
The dog jumps up again.
PHIL
Down , Bruno !
(still musing)
It's tough to find a relationship
like that, especially if your
time is kind of limited. But you
still have to try, don't you?
(the dog again)
Bruno! I told you! Off the bed!
Phil looks over at Angle who's passed out with her mouth open
PHIL
There ' s got to be more to it than
this.
CUT TO :
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil, an eccentric man, plans to rob a bank and live a lavish lifestyle. After robbing a bank, he buys a sports car, goes to the movies, and gets a tattoo. Along the way, he interacts with various characters, including a nosy elderly guest, bank guards, a car salesman, and a rough-looking woman at a biker bar.
Strengths
  • Engaging character development
  • Dynamic plot progression
  • Witty dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Potential for the scene to veer into unrealistic territory
Critique
  • The scene takes a drastic turn in terms of Phil's behavior, showcasing reckless and criminal actions that are out of character based on the previous scenes.
  • The sudden shift in Phil's behavior from carefree and hedonistic to criminal and dangerous may be jarring for the audience and inconsistent with his character development.
  • The scene lacks a clear transition or explanation for Phil's drastic actions, leaving the audience confused and disconnected from the story.
  • The interactions with Mrs. Lancaster and the guards at the bank feel forced and unrealistic, detracting from the overall believability of the scene.
  • The scene lacks depth and emotional resonance, focusing more on shock value and sensationalism rather than character development and storytelling.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising Phil's actions to align more closely with his established character traits and motivations, ensuring a smoother transition in his behavior.
  • Provide a clearer explanation or context for Phil's sudden criminal activities, giving the audience a better understanding of his mindset and motivations.
  • Focus on building tension and suspense in a more subtle and nuanced way, rather than relying on extreme actions for shock value.
  • Explore the emotional impact of Phil's choices on himself and the other characters, adding depth and complexity to the scene.
  • Consider incorporating elements of foreshadowing or character development to create a more cohesive and engaging narrative arc.



Scene 17 -  Persistent Pursuit
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. A SIDE STREET - THE NEXT MORNING
Rita is in the news van reviewing the tape of Phil's report
Phil hovers at the open side door.
RITA
You look good. I mean, it came
out all right. How'd you know
where to put the camera?
PHIL
Psychic. So did you have a nice
evening?
RITA
(guarded)
I just had a sandwich, watched
some TV and went to bed.
PHIL
I got my whole body tattooed and
part ied all night with some
nymphomaniac biker chicks.
RITA
(skeptical)
Sounds wholesome. Were those the
new 24-hour disappearing tattoos
or can I see them?
PHIL
No, they're gone. Rita, if you
only had one day to live, what
would you do with it?
-61-


She switches off the videotape and steps out of the van.
RITA
I don't know, Phil. What are you
dying of?
PHIL
No, I mean like what if the
entire world was about to
explode?
RITA
I ' d just want to know where to
put the camera. What are you
looking for, Phil— a date for
the weekend?
She starts walking toward the center of town. Phil sticks
right with her.
PHIL
No, I just want to know you
better. What do you like, what
do you want, what do you think
about, what kind of men are you
interested in, what do you do for
fun?
RITA
(she stops)
Is this real or are you just
going to make me feel like a
fool?
PHIL
I'm just trying to talk to you
like a normal person. Isn't this
how normal people talk?
RITA
Close.
PHIL
Okay, so talk to me. C'mon, I'll
buy you a cup of coffee.
CUT TO:

INT. DINER - A LITTLE LATER
Phil and Rita are at their usual table, drinking coffee.
RITA
I guess I want what everybody
wants— you know, career, love,
marriage, children. So far I
don't have any of it.
-62-

PHIL
You have a career.
RITA
I have a job. Doing stories on
the Punxsutawney groundhog is not
my ultimate goal. No offense.
PHIL
How about the other stuff? You
seeing anybody?
RITA
This is getting too personal. I
don't think I ' m ready to discuss
these things with you. What
about you? What do you want?
PHIL
What I really want is someone
like you.
RITA
Oh, please—
PHIL
Why not?
RITA
Phil, you know, you have so much
talent and ability. If you'd
just drop the attitude and act
like a decent human being, then
maybe I ' d —
(she hesitates)
PHIL
You'd what?
RITA
I don't know what.
PHIL
Then maybe you'd like me?
She stares hard at him.
RITA
I don't know. It's sort of like
the way I feel about UFO's. I'd
have to see it to believe it.
Larry pokes his head in the doorway, looks around, spots Rita
and makes his way over to their table.
-63-

LARRY
(to Rita)
You ready? We better get going
if we're going to stay ahead of
the weather.
RITA
Yeah, I'll be right out, Larry.
Larry scowls at Phil and exits.
PHIL
(to Rita)
Why don't you stay for a while?
The road's going to be closed
anyway. Do you really want to be
stuck in the van with Larry for
three hours?
RITA
I've got to get back. I'll see
you later.
Phil watches Rita exit.
PHIL'S POV
Rita gets in the news van and drives off with Larry.
Phil stares out the window, more" determined than ever to win
her over.
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER•S KNOB - ANOTHER DAY
Phil is wrapping up his groundhog report.
PHIL
Well, you heard it right from the
groundhog's mouth. Bundle up
good, 'cause it's going to be a
long winter— at least in
Punxsutawney. Reporting for
Channel 9, this is Phil Connors.
Larry stops tape.
RITA
That was great. How did you know
the—
PHIL
(preoccupied)
I have to go now. There's
something I have to do.
-64-

Phil runs off without another word of explanation.
CUT TO:

EXT. THE NEWS VAN - LATER
Phil has the hood open and is doing something to the engine.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Rita and Phil review Phil's report in the news van, where Phil asks Rita out on a date. Rita is hesitant but compliments Phil's work. Phil, determined to win her over, abruptly leaves to fix the news van's engine. The scene ends with Phil watching Rita drive away.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character development
  • Exploration of themes
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may come off as overly sarcastic or flippant at times
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition from the previous scene, leaving the audience slightly disoriented.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels forced and unnatural, especially Phil's abrupt shift from joking about partying with biker chicks to asking deep, personal questions.
  • The character development feels rushed, with Rita opening up about her desires and Phil expressing his feelings in a way that doesn't feel earned.
  • The interaction between Phil and Rita lacks subtlety and depth, making it difficult for the audience to connect with their relationship.
  • The scene could benefit from more nuanced and authentic dialogue to convey the emotional depth of the characters.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scene to provide better continuity.
  • Focus on developing the relationship between Phil and Rita more gradually, allowing their connection to evolve naturally.
  • Work on making the dialogue more realistic and reflective of the characters' personalities and emotions.
  • Introduce more subtlety and subtext in the interactions between Phil and Rita to create a deeper and more engaging dynamic.
  • Consider revising the scene to build up the emotional tension and connection between Phil and Rita in a more organic way.



Scene 18 -  A Flirty Winter Romp
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. THE BERGHOF RESTAURANT - LATER
Rita is sitting at the bar in the town's best restaurant, a
good chophouse with Black Forest decor and waitresses dressed
in dirndl skirts and aprons. Phil enters and sits down next to
her.
PHIL
(acting surprised)
Oh, hi, Rita. You still here?
RITA
(glum)
The van won't start. Larry's
working on it.
PHIL
(innocent)
Wouldn't you know it. Buy you a
drink?
RITA
Okay.
PHIL
(to the bartender)
Jack Daniels.
BARTENDER
For you, miss?
RITA
Tequila,with lime. Gold, if
you've got it.
Phil nods to himself.
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SAME SCENE - ANOTHER DAY
Phil walks in and sits next to Rita.
PHIL
(acting surprised)
Oh, hi, Rita. You still here?
-65-

RITA
(glum)
The van won't start. Larry's
working on it.
PHIL
Wouldn't you know it. Buy you a
drink?
RITA
Okay.
PHIL
(to the bartender)
Tequila with lime, gold if you've
got it.
Rita looks at Phil, surprised.
BARTENDER
For you miss?
RITA
Same for me, please.
The BARTENDER pours.
PHIL
(to Rita)
What should we toast to?
RITA
Your call.
PHIL
To the groundhog!
Rita stares for a moment.
RITA
I always drink to world peace.
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SAME SCENE - ANOTHER DAY
BARTENDER
Take your order?
PHIL
Tequila with lime, gold if you've
got it.
Rita looks at Phil.
, BARTENDER
For you, miss?
-66-


RITA
Same for me, please.
The BARTENDER pours.
Phil lifts his glass.
PHIL
To world peace.
Rita smiles, reevaluating him.
RITA
To world peace.
They clink glasses.
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INT. THE BAR - LATER
Rita and Phil are now sitting together at a table, a plate of
cheese and crackers and a bottle of white wine between them.
PHIL
You like your job?
RITA
It's okay. I think it could be
really challenging. Of course
it's about a million miles from
where I started out in college.
PHIL
You weren't in broadcasting?
RITA
At Bryn Mawr? No, uh-uh.
"Believe it or not, I studied
Nineteenth Century French Poetry.
PHIL
(laughs good-naturedly)
Really? What a waste of time.
Rita looks offended. Phil knows he made a mistake.
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SAME SCENE - ANOTHER DAY
PHIL
You weren't in broadcasting?
-67-


RITA
At Bryn Mawr? No, uh-uh.
Believe it or not, I studied
Nineteenth Century French Poetry.
Phil leans in closer to her.
PHIL
La fille qui j'aimera
Sera comme bon vin
Qui se bonifiera
Un peut chaque matin.
Rita smiles, entranced.
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INT. FUDGE SHOP - DAY
Phil and Rita are sitting at a table in a small confectionery,
tasting chunks of different flavored fudge. Rita takes a bite
RITA
This is terrific.
PHIL
Best fudge in town.
RITA
How do you know so much about
Punxsutawney?
PHIL
I like small towns. I think they
engender real community more than
big cities.
RITA
That is so true! I've always
thought that, too.
PHIL
No kidding. Here— try the white
chocolate.
RITA
Oh, yuk, don't make me sick.
PHIL
(making mental note)
No white chocolate.
RITA
There's something so familiar
about this. Do you ever have
deja vu?
Phil smiles. Then Larry enters.
-68-


LARRY
(irate, to Rita)
I don't believe it. Someone
bought every distributor cap in
this town. We're going to be
stuck here all night1
Over Phil's sympathetic look we hear the song, "I Can't Get
Started With You".
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INT. THE BERGHOF RESTAURANT - NIGHT
The music continues over Rita and Phil on the small dance
floor. They dance, close, dreamy, romantic.
CUT TO:

EXT. MAIN STREET - LATER THAT NIGHT
There is a light snow falling. Phil and Rita are making a
little snowman. Somehow the town looks magical tonight— old
fashioned, wholesome.
A snowball hits Phil in the back. He and Rita turn around to
see a giggling KID. Phil packs a snowball and tosses it. The
kid throws one back. Rita and Phil both get into it, packing
snowballs and getting into a war with this kid and his little
gang of friends.
A snowball catches Rita unaware, she slips and goes down in a
snowbank. Phil bends down to help her and slips. They are no
together, lying in the snow, laughing. Their eyes lock for a
long sweet moment, then Rita gets embarrassed and stands up.
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Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Drama"]

Summary At the Bergdof Restaurant, Phil and Rita meet for a drink. Phil acts surprised to see her, but they share a lighthearted conversation. They later visit a fudge shop and sample different flavors. When Rita's van fails to start, Phil helps out. They dance together and build a snowman, engaging in a playful snowball fight with local kids. As they share a private moment, Rita feels embarrassed and quickly gets up from the snow.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Romantic tension
  • Whimsical and playful tone
Weaknesses
  • Lack of intense conflict
  • Some repetitive elements
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear progression or development in the relationship between Phil and Rita. It feels repetitive with the same interactions and dialogue being repeated on different days.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita is somewhat superficial and lacks depth. There is a missed opportunity to explore their characters and emotions more deeply.
  • The scene could benefit from more meaningful and engaging interactions between Phil and Rita, rather than just surface-level conversations and actions.
  • The setting and actions in the scene feel stagnant and do not contribute much to the overall story or character development.
  • The scene lacks a clear purpose or direction, making it feel disconnected from the rest of the script.
Suggestions
  • Add more depth to the conversations between Phil and Rita, exploring their emotions, motivations, and vulnerabilities.
  • Introduce new elements or conflicts to the scene to keep it engaging and moving the story forward.
  • Consider incorporating moments of genuine connection or intimacy between Phil and Rita to show their relationship evolving.
  • Provide more context or background information about the characters to make their interactions more meaningful and relatable.
  • Ensure that each interaction in the scene serves a purpose in advancing the plot or developing the characters.



Scene 19 -  Heartfelt Rejection
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. CHERRY STREET INN - NIGHT
Phil and Rita are walking slowly, very close.
PHIL
What?
RITA
I ' m just amazed. And I'm not
easily amazed.
PHIL
About what?
-69-

RITA
How you can start a day with one
kind of expectation and end up so
completely different.
PHIL
Do you like how this day is
turning out?
RITA
Yes. I like it very much.
They stop dn front of Phil's hotel. She turns to him.
RITA
You could never have planned a
day like this, but it couldn't
have been more perfect.
PHIL
You're wrong. I've been planning
this day for weeks.
Rita ignores the remark and hugs him. Phil tries to kiss her
but she gently puts her fingers to his lips, stopping him.
\ They enter the bed and breakfast inn.

INT. VESTIBULE - CONTINUOUS
Rita hugs him again and starts to exit.
RITA
Thanks. See you tomorrow.
PHIL
Tomorrow? Wait, aren't you going
to come up to my room for a
while?
RITA
(very reluctant)
I don't know, Phil—
PHIL
No•reason to end a perfect day.
RITA
(deciding)
Well— we better not.
PHIL
No, you should. The, uh, the
poetry! I've got some books,
Rimbaud, Beaudelaire, we could
light a fire—
-70-

RITA
Thanks, but —
PHIL
(seeing it all slip
away)
Please come, Rita. It'll be —
RITA
(definite)
Phil, I'm tired. We can be
together tomorrow.
PHIL
(getting desperate)
But there is no tomorrow for me!
RITA
(adamant)
Let's not ruin it, Phil. There's
no way I ' m sleeping with you
tonight.
PHIL
Why not? Rita, I love you!
RITA
You don't even know me!
PHIL
(grabs her hand)
Please! You have to!
Rita shakes loose from his grasp.
RITA
What's wrong with you!
There is a long moment of silent tension, then all her old
doubts about Phil come rushing back.
RITA
(shaking her head)
Oh, no. I can't believe I fell
for it. This whole day was just
one long set-up. And I ate
fudge. Yucchh! I hate fudge.
PHIL
No, it was real. I love you.
RITA
Stop saying that! Do you really
expect me to trust you? The
whole secretarial pool is a Phil
Connors recovery group.
-71-


PHIL
But I can change! I really can—
Rita slaps him hard on the cheek.
RITA
That's for making me care about
you.
She turns and stomps off, leaving Phil standing there hurting.
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EXT. MAIN STREET - ANOTHER NIGHT
The snowball fight with the kids is going on as before. Phil
falls into the snowbank with Rita and they almost kiss.
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INT. QUALITY INN MOTEL - LATER
Phil is trying (MOS) to talk his way into Rita's room. She
^pushes him away and slams the door in his face.
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EXT. MOTEL - NIGHT
The streets are deserted except for Phil, staring up at Rita's
window in the Quality Inn.
Rita comes to her window and looks out. She sees Phil looking
up at her and draws the curtains.
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INT. PHIL'S ROOM - DAWN
"I Got You, Babe" is playing. Phil hits the clock radio to
turn it off. He lies there for a moment, then hefts himself
heavily out of bed, not eager to repeat the day yet another
time. With the radio off, Phil does the deejays' morning
routine himself, seemingly for the millionth time.
PHIL
(dully)
Okay, campers, rise and shine,
and don't forget your booties
because it's cooooold out there
today.
Phil continues the radio report at his own pace, obviously
fatigued.
-72-

PHIL
It's cold out there everyday.
What is this — Miami Beach? Haw.
Not hardly. And you can expect
hazardous travel later today with
that, you know, blizzard thing.
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Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil and Rita have a heartfelt conversation outside the Cherry Street Inn, where Phil expresses his love for Rita but she is hesitant to trust him. Despite Phil's desperate pleas, Rita ultimately walks away, leaving him standing hurt and rejected outside the inn.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Tension building
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive elements in Phil's attempts to win over Rita
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a heartfelt moment between Phil and Rita, but quickly escalates into a tense and emotional confrontation.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels forced and lacks subtlety, making their interactions seem unnatural.
  • The transition from a romantic moment to a heated argument feels abrupt and could benefit from more gradual development.
  • The emotional beats in the scene could be more nuanced and layered to create a more authentic and engaging dynamic between the characters.
  • The scene relies heavily on cliched romantic tropes and could benefit from more original and authentic dialogue and interactions.
Suggestions
  • Consider building up the tension and conflict between Phil and Rita more gradually to make the emotional climax more impactful.
  • Focus on developing more authentic and nuanced dialogue that reflects the complexity of the characters' emotions and motivations.
  • Explore different ways to convey the characters' feelings and conflicts without resorting to cliched romantic tropes.
  • Add more depth to the characters' interactions by incorporating subtle gestures, subtext, and non-verbal communication.
  • Consider revising the scene to create a more organic and realistic progression of emotions and conflicts between Phil and Rita.



Scene 20 -  Groundhog Day: Phil's Unveiled Persona
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
Phil is walking through the crowd. He spots Nancy, walks up to
her and greets her half-heartedly .
PHIL
Hi, Nancy.
NANCY
(pleasantly)
Hi. Do I know you?
Phil can't manage enough enthusiasm to pursue her yet again.
PHIL
No, I guess not. I thought you
were someone else.
Phil wanders over to where Rita and Larry are setting up the
camera. Rita comes over to him.
RITA
Are you all right, Phil? You
look terrible.
Phil looks at her sadly, then turns away.
PHIL
(vacantly)
I'm fine.
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INT . BIKER BAR - NIGHT
The balls CRACK as the cue ball breaks the rack.
Phil is walking around the table, cue in hand, sinking ball
after ball, while several admiring HUSTLERS look on.
FIRST HUSTLER
Who is this guy?
-73-

SECOND HUSTLER
I don't know. Hey, mister—
(Phil doesn't stop
shooting)
Who are you, anyway?
Phil shoots, sinks a tough one.
PHIL
You don't know me? I've been
playing here every day for two
months.
FIRST HUSTLER
Oh, yeah? So how come I ain't
seen you?
PHIL
I don't know. I seen you.
SECOND HUSTLER
So what's your name?
PHIL
They call me— Punxsutawney Phil.
SECOND HUSTLER
Punxsutawney Phil? Like the
groundhog.
PHIL
Yeah, like the groundhog.
Phil sinks another one.
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EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
The crowd is waiting expectantly for the groundhog to appear
Phil is a wreck, squatting unprofessionally in front of the
camera.
PHIL
(cynically)
This is one of the most pitiful
spectacles known to civilization.
With one nod from a filthy rodent
best known to pest control
agencies, a moribund old coal
mining hamlet turns magically
into the Lourdes of Pennsylvania,
Mecca to thousands of people who,
if they hated the winter so
damned much, why don't they move
to Florida, anyway?
-74-

Larry and Rita look on, incredulous.
. CUT TO:
CLOSE UP - TV SET
The program JEOPARDY! is playing.
ALEX TREBECK
(on TV)
Nobel prize-winning co-
discoverers of the DNA molecule.
PHIL (O.C.)
Who are Watson and Crick.
CONTESTANT
(on TV)
Who are Watson and Crick?
ALEX
(on TV)
Correct.
There is a cheering from a small group of people off-screen.

INT. PARLOR - CONTINUOUS
Phil is sitting in his bathrobe in a big lounge chair in the
parlor of his hotel. Mrs. Lancaster, and other guests watch
his performance, awed by his "intellect."
ALEX
(on TV)
Twin brother and sister Sebastian
and Olivia create confusion in
this Shakespearean comedy.
PHIL
What is "Twelfth Night."
CONTESTANT
(on TV)
What is "Twelfth Night?"
ALEX
(on TV)
Correct.
More cheering from the small group.
CONTESTANT
(on TV)
I'll take New Jersey for eight
hundred, Alex.
-75-

ALEX
(on TV)
And the answer is— an audio
daily double.
PHIL
Count Basie.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Drama"]

Summary As Phil navigates Gobbler's Knob and a biker bar, his disorientation and failed attempts to connect with others create inner turmoil. Despite his struggles, he exhibits surprising confidence as "Punxsutawney Phil" and demonstrates his intelligence at a hotel parlor.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Well-developed characters
  • Humorous yet reflective tone
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive elements
  • Occasional lack of clarity in character motivations
Critique
  • The transition from Phil seeing Nancy to the biker bar scene feels abrupt and disconnected. It's not clear why Phil suddenly shifts from interacting with Nancy to playing pool in a biker bar.
  • The dialogue between Phil and the hustlers at the biker bar lacks depth and doesn't add much to the scene. It feels like filler dialogue that doesn't contribute to the overall story.
  • Phil's cynical speech at Gobbler's Knob comes off as forced and out of character based on the previous scenes. It feels like a sudden shift in tone without a clear motivation.
  • The scene with Phil watching Jeopardy! and impressing the other guests with his knowledge feels random and doesn't add much to the overall narrative. It seems like a disconnected moment that doesn't serve a purpose.
  • The scene lacks a clear emotional throughline or character development for Phil. It feels disjointed and doesn't contribute to the overall arc of the story.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising the transition between Phil seeing Nancy and the biker bar scene to make it more seamless and logical.
  • Focus on creating meaningful interactions and dialogue in the biker bar scene that contribute to Phil's character development or the overall story.
  • Revisit Phil's speech at Gobbler's Knob to ensure it aligns with his character and motivations established in previous scenes.
  • Evaluate the relevance of the Jeopardy! scene and consider either integrating it more effectively into the narrative or removing it altogether.
  • Work on establishing a clear emotional arc and character growth for Phil in this scene to ensure it aligns with the overall story progression.



Scene 21 -  Groundhog Day Madness
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 6
EXT. STREET - DAY
Phil is walking through town, still dressed only in his pajamas
and overcoat, counting the sidewalk cracks, taking giants steps
from one to the next. He looks crazy.
PHIL
Two thousand six hundred and
seventy-one—
(takes another step)
two thousand six hundred and
seventy-two—
(another step)
two thousand six hundred and
seventy-thr-ee-^-
A woman passes walking her dog.
PHIL
Hey, pick up after your dog!
DOG WALKER
He hasn't done anything.
PHIL
He's going to!
(pointing)
There and there. And there!
Phil continues walking, counting the sidewalk cracks. THREE
NEIGHBORHOOD KIDS notice Phil and walk along, matching him step
for step.
iPHIL
Two thousand six hundred and
seventy-four, two thousand six
hundred and seventy-five, two
thousand'—
JOEY
Five million eight hundred—
PHIL
Six hundred—
MIKE AND SUE
Ninety, twenty, four, six, fifty—
-76-

PHIL
Two thousand, four hundred—
JOEY, MIKE AND SUE
Two, eight, nine, forty-six—
Phil stops. He has lost count. His lip curls up like an
animal as he turns slowly, growling at the kids. They run away
screaming with glee. Phil starts after them but runs right
into a COP.
COP
You got a problem, buddy?
PHIL
(out of control)
Yeah, I got a problem, buddy! I
can't stand this place anymore!
I can't stand this street and I
can't stand the fourteen bars and
the five banks and the one star
food and the bad weather and the
"quaint" little shops and most of
all, I can't stand anything—
ANYTHING— with a groundhog on
it.
He rips a groundhog patch off the cop's jacket sleeve.
COP
(calmly)
Okay. Then let's see what we can
do about getting you out of here.
You got a name?
PHIL
(eyes downcast)
Phil.
COP
Phil. Like the groundhog!
Phil turns to the cop like a rabid dog, ready to strike.
PHIL
Yeah, like the—
(he stops as if struck)
—groundhog.
Some big new idea has formed in his mind.
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EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - EARLY MORNING
Rita is looking at Phil as Larry videotapes his report.
-77-

LARRY
(turning to Rita)
The guy's nuts. He's out of his
gourd.
RITA
Let him finish, then I'll call
the station.
They turn back to watch Phil's wrap-up.
Phil is completely unkempt, still wearing only pajama bottoms
and his overcoat, looking even more demented.
PHIL
(to camera)
There is no way this winter is
ever going to end as long as that
groundhog keeps seeing his shadow
everyday. I don't see any other
way out. He's got to be stopped
and I've got to stop him. For
Channel 9 news, this is Phil
Connors.
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EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - NIGHT
Phil is walking around the mound, casing it out. He takes a
rifle out from under his coat and sneaks up to the burrow. He
pulls a smoke bomb from his pocket, lights it, and throws it
into the hole, then scurries for the edge of the knob and hits
the deck. He lifts his rifle and aims it.
Smoke is now pouring from the mound. Lots of it.
Phil waits, his trigger finger twitching.
A WOMAN casually walks by, stops. She surveys the situation.
WOMAN
He ain't there.
Phil doesn't move. He-doesn't care that she sees him.
WOMAN
You can wait all night, but he
ain't coming out. He don't live
there. They keep him in the
library.
Phil's gun droops. The woman begins to walk off, then stops.
WOMAN
Plug him once for me.
-78-

She leaves.
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EXT. CIVIC CENTER - DAY
Phil passes a pedestal bearing a life-size bronze statue of the
groundhog and enters the public library.

INT. LIBRARY - CONTINUOUS
Phil walks past the front desk looking very haggard and
dangerous, and enters the children's section. No one is
present except the CHILDREN'S LIBRARIAN, a young woman,
reshelving books in the stacks. He looks around quickly and
sees a window in the wall and over it a large sign which reads:
"Punxsutawney Phil - The Great Prognosticates"
Phil heads right for it.
The groundhog scurries around his little temperature-controlled
habitat, oblivious to the approaching danger.
As Phil approaches the groundhog display, he reaches into his
overcoat and pulls out a pump shotgun with a short pistol grip.
The children's librarian sees the gun and freezes.
Phil pumps a shell into the chamber as he walks right up to the
case.
PHIL'S POV
The groundhog looks right into his sights.
Philsqueezes the trigger. LOUD GUNSHOT.
The glass window is still intact, not a scratch on it. The
groundhog looks up playfully.
Phil fires off four more rounds but, again, no results. Phil
can't believe it. He charges the glass and pounds it with the
rifle butt. He can't even chip it. Suddenly he is seized from
behind by TWO STRONG MEN who take the rifle from him and
wrestle him to floor.
The librarian comes running up and looks at the groundhog.
BYSTANDER
Is he all right?
LIBRARIAN
He's just fine. That's two
inches of bullet-proof glass
there. You can't be too careful
in this day and age.
-79-

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EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
The groundhog is just poking his head out of the hole. He
stands full height and looks around.
Phil looks directly at the groundhog with hate and scheming
madness.
Suddenly, Phil whips out a big kitchen knife from under his
icoat and dives at the groundhog. Town officials and police
throw themselves on Phil as the groundhog scampers safely back
into his hole.
Rita and Larry videotape the incident, aghast at Phil's insane
attack.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Drama","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil, in his pajamas, becomes increasingly erratic and violent in Punxsutawney on Groundhog Day. He accuses a woman of not picking up after her dog, goes on a tirade against the town, and tries to harm the groundhog multiple times. His actions are thwarted by the police, leading to his arrest.
Strengths
  • Surreal atmosphere
  • Dark humor
  • Intense conflict
Weaknesses
  • Minimal dialogue
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a strong visual of Phil counting sidewalk cracks in his pajamas, which effectively conveys his deteriorating mental state.
  • The interaction with the neighborhood kids adds a touch of humor and showcases Phil's growing frustration and isolation.
  • Phil's outburst towards the police officer and his sudden epiphany about his name being like the groundhog's name adds an interesting twist to the scene.
  • The escalating tension and Phil's descent into madness are well portrayed, especially with his failed attempts to harm the groundhog.
  • The scene effectively sets up Phil's increasing desperation and detachment from reality, leading to a shocking and intense climax.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal monologue or dialogue to further explore Phil's unraveling mental state and motivations.
  • Enhance the visual cues and symbolism to emphasize Phil's disconnect from reality and his obsession with the groundhog.
  • Explore the consequences of Phil's actions on his relationships with other characters, especially Rita and the townspeople.
  • Consider adding a moment of reflection or realization for Phil after the failed attempts to harm the groundhog to deepen his character arc.
  • Ensure the resolution of this scene ties back to the overall themes and narrative of the screenplay.



Scene 22 -  Phil's Downward Spiral and Demise
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 7
  • Dialogue: 6
EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - ANOTHER DAY
Larry and Rita are loading their equipment back into the van.
Rita spots Phil standing on the other side of the crowd,
staring at her. She marches straight over to him, furious.
RITA
Where were you this morning? How
could you possibly miss the
shoot?
PHIL
(at the end of his
rope)
I've come to the end of me, Rita.
There's only one way out now.
Just remember/we had a wonderful
day together once.
Phil kisses her gently on the cheek and walks off toward the
back of the knob. Rita watches him, then follows at a discreet
distance, very worried.
In a small clearing behind the man-made groundhog burrow,
Buster Greene and TWO other GROUNDHOG CLUB OFFICIALS are
lifting a cage into the front seat of Buster's pickup.
BUSTER
(to the groundhog)
There you go, ol' buddy. Good
job. Hey! He smiled at me. See
that?
FIRST OFFICIAL
Right.
-80-

BUSTER
(securing the cage)
There, little fella.
The other official looks up and sees Phil walking toward them
like a zombie.
OTHER OFFICIAL
Hi, there, mister. Something I
can do you for?
Without a word, Phil jumps quickly into the cab of the pickup
and starts it up .
FIRST OFFICIAL
Hey! What 're you — !
Phil drives off in Buster's truck.
Rita witnesses the groundhog-napping and runs back toward the
knob.
RITA
(shouts)
Larry!
Buster and his aides race for another car parked nearby.
BUSTER
Jake! Call the police, and get
the word out. Somebody kidnapped
Phil. We're going after him.
Come on, Tommy!
They jump into a car, Buster guns the engine and takes off
after the pickup.
Rita runs up to Larry and grabs the camera on the fly.
RITA
Let's go! Phil just snatched the
groundhog!
Larry does a slow take and starts gathering up the rest of the
gear.
LARRY
(mutters)
Probably some kind of gerbil
deal. Pervert.
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-81-


EXT. LOCAL ROAD - MINUTES LATER
Phil comes tearing around a slippery curve, followed by Buster
in his car, and close behind him, a contingent of police cars
and the Channel 9 news van.

INT. PICKUP - CONTINUOUS
Phil looks at the groundhog on the seat next to him, then
punches the gas as he turns up a mountain drive.
PHIL
Coming to the end of the trail,
Phil. Then we're going out in a
blaze of glory.

INT. BUSTER'S CAR - SAME TIME
Buster pursues Phil with relentless determination.
BUSTER
Nobody takes my groundhog and
gets away with it.
.. • .
INT. THE NEWS VAN - SAME TIME
Rita is driving. Larry is hooking up the camera.
RITA
(very upset)
What is he doing? What can he be
thinking? He must1 ve just —
snapped.
Larry squeezes into the passenger seat with the camera mounted
on his shoulder .
LARRY
This oughta be good.

EXT. MOUNTAIN ROAD - CONTINUOUS
The cars chase the pickup to the top of the mountain.

INT. BUSTER'S CAR - CONTINUOUS
BUSTER
Okay! I know this road. There's
no way off ' cept the way we come
up.
FIRST OFFICIAL
All right! We got him now.
-82-

EXT. LOGGER'S LEAP - CONTINUOUS
The pickup is losing its lead over the pursuers as it nears the
sharp mountain cliff.

INT. THE PICKUP - SAME TIME
Phil looks in his rearview mirror at the cars chasing him. He
glances down at the groundhog. He takes a breath.
PHIL
Okay, pal. It's showtime.
Phil hits the gas.

INT. THE NEWS VAN - SAME TIME
Larry is taping as Rita comes around the curve just in time to
see the pickup truck speeding toward the cliff. Rita hits the
brakes and watches in horror.
RITA
PHIL! NO!


EXT. LOGGER'S LEAP - CONTINUOUS
The pickup bursts through a retaining fence and rockets over
the edge of the cliff.
The pickup seems to hang in the air for a long time, then it
begins its SLOW MOTION descent, falling ever so gracefully
until it impacts on the granite rock face far below.
BIG EXPLOSION. BIG FIREBALL. FLAMING WRECKAGE. Then a small
click, followed by "I Got You, Babe."
DISSOLVE TO:
PHIL
He slowly opens his eyes and blinks. He looks around and
realizes he's back in his room at the bed and breakfast.
PHIL
Ah, nuts!
Phil throws off the covers and hurls himself out of bed.
CUT TO:
-83-

INT. NED RYERSON'S OFFICE - DAY
Ned and a client are huddled over his desk, looking at some
papers. A BODY DROPS quickly past the window behind them.
It's Phil.
They rush to the window and look down at the sidewalk three
stories below. Phil is sprawled there like a broken puppet,
lifeless.

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - DAWN
"I Got You, Babe" is playing. Phil wakes up and smashes the
radio.
CUT TO:

EXT. STREET - DAY
Rita and Larry are walking down the street when a GREYHOUND BUS
pulls out of the bus station and accelerates down Main Street.
Suddenly, Phil, dressed in pajamas and overcoat, leaps out in
front of the speeding bus. Rita witnesses the whole incident.
DRIVERS' POV
He sees Phil through the windshield but doesn't even have time
to hit the brakes before he runs right over Phil.
CUT TO:
A TV SCREEN
A woman in some horror movie is screaming.
REVEAL
Mrs. Lancaster is watching TV in the parlor of the hotel. In
the corridor behind her, Phil walks by, dressed in a robe,
carrying an electric toaster and a towel, heading for the
bathroom.
A few moments pass.
We hear the zap of an electrocution, the lights and TV flicker
and dim for a moment, then come back on again.
CUT TO:

EXT. THE BANK - DAY
The building is surrounded by police, all crouched behind their
cars with guns and rifles trained on the doors.
-84-

Suddenly, the doors burst open and Phil comes running out of
the bank screaming, dressed in camouflage fatigues and armed to
the teeth with an assault rifle in one hand, an Uzi in the
other and a couple of handguns stuck in his belt. He doesn't
get three feet before he is shot down in an incredible hail of
gunfire.
Rita stands beside the camera gaping in horror while Larry
records the grisly massacre.
Genres: ["Comedy","Drama","Action"]

Summary After erratically disappearing during the groundhog shoot, Phil kidnaps the groundhog, leading to a high-speed chase involving Rita, Larry, Buster Greene, the police, and a news van. Phil's descent into madness culminates in him driving the truck off a cliff and experiencing a series of terrifying dream sequences involving his death. The chase ends with Phil being gunned down by police outside a bank, leaving Rita devastated.
Strengths
  • Engaging plot
  • Strong emotional impact
  • Unexpected twists
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
Critique
  • The scene is intense and dramatic, with Phil's erratic behavior escalating to a dangerous level.
  • The actions of Phil, such as stealing the groundhog, driving off a cliff, and ultimately getting shot by the police, showcase his descent into madness.
  • The scene effectively conveys the chaos and desperation of Phil's character as he reaches a breaking point.
  • The use of slow-motion and impactful visuals, such as the flaming wreckage and Phil's leap in front of the bus, adds to the tension and shock value of the scene.
  • The scene effectively builds suspense and keeps the audience engaged with the unpredictable actions of Phil.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal conflict or reflection from Phil to provide insight into his mindset and motivations leading up to his extreme actions.
  • Explore the emotional impact on Rita and Larry witnessing Phil's dangerous behavior to deepen their character development.
  • Provide a clearer resolution or aftermath to Phil's actions to show the consequences of his behavior and the impact on the other characters.
  • Consider incorporating moments of redemption or growth for Phil to add depth to his character arc and provide a more satisfying conclusion.
  • Ensure the scene maintains a balance between the intense action and the emotional stakes to create a well-rounded and impactful narrative.



Scene 23 -  Phil's Revelation
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. CORONER'S - DAY
Rita stands by weeping while Phil's body is covered with a
sheet.
In the shadowy darkness under the sheet, a CLICK is heard and
Phil's eyes pop open. "I Got You, Babe" plays.

INT. PHIL'S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil pulls the sheet off his face and finds himself back in his
bed in his room. A tear falls from his eye.
CUT TO:

INT. DINER - DAY
Phil and Rita are sitting in the diner at their regular table.
RITA
I ' m sorry. What was that again?
PHIL
I'm a god.
RITA
You're God?
PHIL
No, I'm A god. Not THE God— at
least I don't think I am.
RITA
That's reassuring. For a mintute
there I thought you might be
crazy.
PHIL
No, it's true. It's the only
possible explanation. I'm a
supernatural being.
RITA
Because you survived a car wreck?
-85-

The waiter comes to the table.
WAITER
Are you ready to order?
PHIL
(to Rita, ignoring the
waiter)
Not just the car wreck! I didn't
just blow up yesterday, you know.
I've been run over, drowned,
crushed, stabbed, shot,
electrocuted, poisoned, frozen,
burned, and asphyxiated—
RITA
Really?
The waiter looks at him like he's nuts.
PHIL
—but I always wake up the next
day without a scratch, without
even a headache. I'm telling
you, I ' m immortal.
WAITER
The special today is blueberry
waffles.
RITA
Why are you telling me this?
WAITER
(shrugs)
Because some people like
blueberry waffles.
RITA
(to the waiter)
Not you— him.
PHIL
Because I want you to believe in
me.
RITA
You're not a god, Phil. Take my
word for it. This is twelve
years of Catholic school talking.
WAITER
I could come back if you're not
ready.
PHIL
How do you know I'm not a god?
-86-

RITA
Please.
PHIL
How do you know?
RITA
Because it's not possible.
WAITER
I'll come back.
The /waiter turns to leave.
PHIL
Hey, Billy!
The waiter turns back.
PHIL
This is Bill. He's been a waiter
for three years because he left
Penn State and had to find work.
He likes the town, he paints toy
soldiers, and he's gay.
WAITER
I am notl
Phil grabs an astonished Rita and pulls her over to the next
table.
RITA
What are you doing?
PHIL
This is Doris Kleiser and her
fiance Fred.
DORIS
Do I know you?
PHIL
They're supposed to get married
tonight but Doris is having
second thoughts.
FRED
What!
Doris touces her engagement ring, dumbfounded. Rita is a
little embarrassed.
RITA
Lovely ring.
DORIS
Thanks.
-87-

Phil drags Rita to the counter.
PHIL
This is Ralph. Say "Hi," Rita.
Rita flashes a quick smile.
RALPH
Don't believe I've had the—
PHIL
Ralph hates his life here and
wants to drive around town
smashing into policemen.
RALPH
Well, who don't?
RITA
This is some kind of trick.
PHIL
Yes, it's a trick. But maybe the
real God cheats, too. Maybe God
isn't omnipotent— he's just had
a lot of practice.
RITA
How about that guy?
PHIL
Tom. Worked in the coal mine
•til they shut it down.
RITA
Her?
PHIL '
Nancy. Went to Lincoln High
School in Pittsburgh. Takes
herself out to lunch once a week.
Rita is getting very bewildered. From their reactions she can
see that Phil is right about each and every one of them.
RITA
How do you know these people!
PHIL
I told you the truth. In five
seconds there's going to be a
grease fire in the kitchen.
Five, four—
RITA
This is nuts.
-88-

PHIL
—three, two, one.
Phil points to the kitchen as smoke starts pouring from the
service window. Everyone in the diner is now staring at them
RITA
(trying to puzzle it
out)
Okay, enough. Let's just sit
down and think for a second.
(they sit)
What do you know about me, Phil?
Do you know me, too?
Phil takes a long pause.
PHIL
I know all about you, Rita. I
know you like producing, but hope
for better than Channel 9,
Pittsburgh.
RITA
Everyone knows that.
PHIL
You like boats but not the ocean.
There's a lake you go to in the
summer with your family, up in
the mountains, with an old wooden
dock and a boathouse with boards
missing in the roof, and a place
you used to crawl underneath to
be alone, and at night you'd look
up and see the stars. You're a
sucker for Rocky Road, Marlon
Brando, and French poetry.
You're wonderfully generous;
you're kind to strangers, and
children; and when you stand in
the snow, you look like an angel.

RITA
How are you doing this?
PHIL
I told you! I wake up every day
right here, right in
Punxsutawney, and it's always
February second and I can't turn
it off. If you still don't
believe me, listen—
RITA
But, Phil—
-89-

PHIL
Listen! In ten seconds Larry is
going to walk through that door
and take you away from me.
RITA
Larry?
PHIL
But you can't let him. Please
believe me. You've got to
believe me.
RITA
I don't —
Larry pokes his head in the doorway, looks around and spots
Rita.
PHIL
Look.
As Rita turns around to see Larry, Phil grabs a pen and pad
from a passing waitress and quickly writes something down as
Larry makes his way to their table. Phil finishes writing.
LARRY
(to Rita)
You ready? We better get going
if we're going to stay ahead of
the weather.
Phil hands the paper to Rita. She reads it.
RITA
(reading)
" . . . stay ahead of the weather. "
Larry looks at the paper.
LARRY
What ' s that?
Rita looks at Phil with new understanding and empathy.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Drama","Fantasy","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary Phil discloses his immortality to Rita, demonstrating his omnipotence by revealing personal facts about strangers. He predicts a grease fire, proving his claims. Rita becomes convinced when he accurately predicts Larry's arrival and actions, leaving her contemplating the extraordinary reality he presents.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be confusing for viewers unfamiliar with the concept of a time loop
Critique
  • The scene transitions abruptly from Phil's apparent death to him waking up in his room, which may confuse the audience and disrupt the flow of the narrative.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels rushed and lacks depth, especially considering the weight of the revelation Phil is sharing with Rita.
  • The interaction with the waiter and other patrons in the diner feels forced and unrealistic, detracting from the emotional impact of the scene.
  • The scene lacks subtlety in conveying Phil's supernatural abilities, with the sudden appearance of a grease fire feeling contrived.
  • The pacing of the scene is uneven, with moments of intense dialogue followed by awkward pauses and rushed interactions.
Suggestions
  • Consider a smoother transition between Phil's 'death' and waking up in his room to maintain coherence.
  • Develop the dialogue between Phil and Rita to delve deeper into the emotional impact of Phil's revelation and Rita's response.
  • Focus on creating more natural and believable interactions with the other characters in the diner to enhance the authenticity of the scene.
  • Introduce Phil's supernatural abilities in a more subtle and nuanced manner to build suspense and intrigue.
  • Work on balancing the pacing of the scene to ensure a consistent flow of tension and emotion throughout.



Scene 24 -  A Day with Phil
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. PUNXSUTAWNEY - DAY
Phil and Rita are walking down the sidewalk.
PHIL
Afer I got over the shock, it was
kind of fun for the first year or
two. I had anything I wanted.
Except you, of course.
-90-


Phil abruptly pulls Rita aside. A big pile of snow slides off
a roof and onto the sidewalk where they would have walked.
Phil doesn't even look up. Rita looks, as if she's seeing a
miracle.
RITA
How did this start?
PHIL
I don't know. I just woke up.
Just like always.
NED RY-ERSON approaches.
NED
Hey, Phil! Phil Connors 1
PHIL
Rita, this is Ned Ryerson. He's
an asshole.
NED
He remembers me!
Phil and Rita keep walking. Rita looks back at Ned, perplexed
PHIL
Trust me on that one.
CUT TO:

EXT. FUDGE SHOP - DAY
Phil and Rita come out of the shop, sharing pieces of fudge.
RITA
This is great.
PHIL
No, it isn't. You hate fudge.
. RITA
Just how well do we know each
other?
PHIL
I told you. I know everybody.
Rita stops walking.
RITA
Did we ever...you know?
PHIL
(teasing)
Did we ever! You were an animal.
-91-


RITA
Come on.
PHIL
You're European trained, aren't
you.
Phil continues walking.
RITA
(blushing)
Phil! It's not funny.
She catches up to him. Phil turns to her.
PHIL
You weren't interested.
RITA
(relieved)
Okay.
She begins walking again.
RITA
Not that it would've been so
awful.
PHIL
I understand.
RITA
I just had to know whether to
smack you or not.
PHIL
You did.
RITA
Good.
CUT TO:

EXT. PARK - DAY
Phil and Rita are sitting on a park bench.
PHIL
So do you believe any of this?
RITA
I don't know. I don't know how
else you could know so much.
Maybe it is really happening.
-92-

PHIL
I used to try to stay up all
night sometimes. I thought if I
could stay conscious I could
figure out what was going on, or
at least hang onto something from
the day before. But I gave up on
that a long time ago.
Rita looks at him with compassion.
RITA
It sounds so— lonely.
PHIL
(trying to shrug it
off)
It's not that bad. You get used
to it.
Rita comes to a decision.
RITA
Maybe I should spend the rest of
the day with you— as an
objective witness. Just to see
what happens. Okay?
PHIL
Yeah, sure. That'd be okay.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Romantic Comedy","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil and Rita walk down the sidewalk in Punxsutawney, Pennsylvania, when a pile of snow nearly hits them. Rita sees it as a miracle and asks Phil about his time loop. They meet Ned Ryerson, whom Phil teases. Rita shares fudge with Phil and they discuss their past interactions. Rita decides to spend the day with Phil to observe his time loop.
Strengths
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Intriguing concept
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may come off as overly dramatic or forced
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition between Phil and Rita walking down the sidewalk and the interaction with Ned Ryerson at the fudge shop, making the scene feel disjointed.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita at the fudge shop feels forced and lacks depth, especially when discussing their past interactions.
  • The humor in Phil calling Ned Ryerson an 'asshole' comes off as juvenile and detracts from the overall tone of the scene.
  • Rita's sudden decision to spend the rest of the day with Phil as an 'objective witness' feels contrived and lacks a believable motivation.
  • The conversation between Phil and Rita on the park bench about Phil's loneliness and Rita's empathy could be more emotionally impactful with deeper exploration of their characters' feelings.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition between the sidewalk and fudge shop scenes to improve the flow of the narrative.
  • Enhance the dialogue at the fudge shop to delve deeper into Phil and Rita's relationship and past interactions for more emotional resonance.
  • Reconsider the humor involving Ned Ryerson to ensure it aligns with the overall tone of the scene and the character dynamics.
  • Provide a more convincing reason for Rita's decision to spend the day with Phil, perhaps by exploring her curiosity or empathy in more depth.
  • Expand on the conversation between Phil and Rita on the park bench to delve into their emotions and the impact of Phil's situation on their relationship.



Scene 25 -  Late Night Confessions
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. PHIL'S ROOM - NIGHT
A hat is lying on Phil's bed. A playing card flies past. A
second playing card sails right into the hat. Another playing
card sails past, missing. Another playing card sails right in
Phil and Rita are tossing cards. Rita is missing. Phil is
hitting.
PHIL
It's not in the wrist so much as
the fingers. Be the hat.
RITA
It would take me a year to get
good at this.
PHIL
Uh-uh. Six months. Four, five
hours a day.
RITA
Is this what you do with
eternity?
-93-


PHIL
Now you know. It's like waiting
for a bus that never comes . You
should see me play pool — and
bowling, juggling, hacky sack.
I can ride a unicycle.
There ' s a knock on the door .
PHIL
I'll get it!
Phil jumps for the door and opens it. The PIZZA GUY is there.
PHIL
Hi, Marty. $11.75 including the
delivery charge, right?
PIZZA GUY
Uhhhh—
Phil pays him, takes the pizza and closes the door.
RITA
(opening the pizza box)
MMMM. Pepperoni and olives. My
favorite .
PHIL
Of course. I told you, I know
everything .
RITA
(taking a bite of
pizza)
I don ' t think I ' d want to know
everything that ' s going to
happen. I like to be surprised.
PHIL
That's not the worst part.
RITA
What's the worst part?
PHIL
The worst part is starting over
everyday. Tomorrow you won't
remember any of this. You'll go
back to treating me like a
complete jerk —
RITA
No —
PHIL
It's not your fault. I am a
jerk.
-94-


RITA
No, you're not.
PHIL
Okay, I ' m not. It really doesn't
make a lot of difference. I've
killed myself so many times, I
don't even exist anymore. I'm
just completely empty.
RITA
Or completely clean.
PHIL
If you're going to be this
positive all the time I may have
to rough you up a little.
RITA
Wait! Have we done this before?
PHIL
Which part?
RITA
You getting me up here, the card
game, the pizza—
PHIL
No, this is the first time.
RITA
(excited)
Well?
PHIL
Well, what?
RITA
Well how does it feel to be doing
something completely new?
Phil looks at her with tremendous affection and gratitude.
PHIL
Good. Really good.
He takes a slice of pizza and starts eating with gusto.
DISSOLVE TO:
THE PIZZA BOX - LATER
There's only one slice left.
Phil and Rita are sitting together on the bed, close but not
touching. Soft music is playing on the radio.
-95-


RITA
Sometimes I wish I had a thousand
lifetimes. One to be a great
journalist. One to, I don't
know, go back to school, study
art, or auto mechanics. One just
to take care of all the busywork,
you know, pay the bills, get my
car tuned up. One to be the wild
woman of Borneo. One to be
Mother Theresa. Maybe it's not
a curse, Phil. It all just
depends on how you look at it.
Phil stares at her for a long time letting this sink in. Then
he belches really loud. Rita stares at him, then burps
surprisingly loud herself.
RITA
I want you to know, it's been a
really nice day for me.
PHIL
Me, too.
RITA
Maybe, if it's not too boring for
you, we could do it again.
PHIL
I hope so.
The clock reads 11:59. Rita grabs Phil's hand. He puts his
arm around her.
They look into each others' eyes. Rita gives Phil a reassuring
smile. She squeezes his hand. Their eyes turn to the clock.
11:;59 turns to 12:00.
Rita looks up at Phil as if expecting some magical event.
RITA
You're still here!
PHIL
I know.
RITA
I thought you were supposed to
disappear— or I was or
something.
PHIL
Not 'til six.
RITA
You rat!
-96-


She is mad in a playful way.
PHIL
I never said midnight—
RITA
You knew I was waiting for
midnight!
PHIL
But I never said it.
RITA
Oh, I can't believe you!
(she slugs him with a
pillow)
I didn't know this was going to
take all night!
PHIL
Does that mean you're going?
RITA
No.
Phil takes Rita's hand. She doesn't resist.
DISSOLVE TO:
LATER
Rita is now sitting right next to Phil on the bed, her head
resting on his shoulder. She nods off then catches herself.
RITA
I'm sorry.
PHIL
It's okay to go to sleep you
know. I promise I won't touch
you— much.
RITA
No, it's all right. I'm not
tired. What were you saying?
Her eyes start to close again.
PHIL
I was saying that the cow was
eventually returned to it's
rightful owner.
RITA
(drifting off)
Really?
-97-


PHIL
That's right.
He looks at her, sees she's truly asleep, and gently maneuvers
her into a comfortable reclining position on the bed. Then he
carefully puts a pillow under her head and settles down next to
her.
PHIL
What I was going to say was, I
think you're the kindest,
sweetest, prettiest, most
wonderful girl I ever met in my
life.
She starts to stir but he gently kisses her back to sleep.
PHIL
Shhhh. That's good.
(satisfied she's still
asleep)
I could never tell you this, but
from the first minute I looked at
you I wanted to just hold you
close and be with you forever.
iEverytime I -saw you around the
station, I thought my heart was
going to explode. I used to
dream about us being together.
In my dream you loved me as much
as I loved you and we didn't have
to say anything but I knew you
understood everything.
She stirs again but he kisses her until she returns to deep
sleep.
PHIL
I know a guy like me could never
deserve to have someone like you,
but if I did, I swear I would
love you for the rest of my life.
Rita opens her eyes.
RITA
(half-asleep)
Did you say something?
PHIL
Good-night, Rita.
He kisses her gently on the forehead.
RITA
Good-night, Phil.
-98-

C LOSE UP - THE CLOCK
The time changes from 5:59 to 6:00. The radio starts playing.
Phil wakes up alone in bed. He lies there for a moment then
leaps out of bed like a man reborn and heads straight for the
shower.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil and Rita spend a heartfelt evening together in Phil's room, playing cards and ordering pizza. They have a deep conversation about life and relationships, with Phil eventually confessing his feelings for Rita while she sleeps on his shoulder. The scene ends with Phil waking up alone in bed, feeling rejuvenated and ready to face a new day.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Authentic character development
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Limited action
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear focus and purpose, leading to a disjointed and meandering narrative.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita feels forced and unnatural, lacking depth and authenticity.
  • The transition between playful banter and serious confessions is abrupt and jarring, making it difficult for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The scene lacks subtlety and nuance in exploring the themes of eternity, self-discovery, and relationships.
  • The pacing of the scene is uneven, with moments of intense emotion followed by mundane interactions, creating a disjointed rhythm.
Suggestions
  • Focus on developing a clear and cohesive narrative arc for the scene, with a central conflict or theme to drive the dialogue and character interactions.
  • Work on refining the dialogue to make it more natural and reflective of the characters' personalities and emotions.
  • Consider streamlining the scene to eliminate unnecessary or repetitive elements, allowing for a more focused and impactful storytelling.
  • Explore deeper emotional layers and character motivations to create a more engaging and relatable scene.
  • Pay attention to the pacing and structure of the scene to ensure a smooth and coherent flow of events, building towards a satisfying resolution.



Scene 26 -  Groundhog Day Preparations
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
Rita and Larry are in the packed press area, beginning to set
up the equipment.
Phil arrives, carrying two cups of coffee.
PHIL
Rita?
She looks at him without a trace of the rapport they shared the
night before.
RITA
Oh, hi, Phil.
PHIL
Thought you might like some—
He hands her the coffee.
RITA
Thanks!
PHIL
Careful, it's hot. Larry?
He hands Larry a cup.
LARRY
(surprised, mutters)
Yeah, great.
RITA
We're just setting up.
PHIL
You know, I bumped into Buster
Greene, he kind of runs this
thing, and he tipped me off that
we might get a better shot over
there.
RITA
Really?
-99-

PHIL
I mean, maybe we should go for
it. What do you think?
RITA
Sounds good to me. Larry?
LARRY
Sure, why not?
RITA
All right. Thanks, Phil. Good
work.
She reaches for an equipment case.
PHIL
I'll get that.
Phil helps Larry carry the camera gear.
PHIL
(to Larry)
You and I never talk, Larry. You
got kids?
Larry looks suspicious. Rita looks on, reevaluating Phil.
CUT TO:

INT. LIBRARY - DAY
Phil enters the library, approaches the Librarian.
PHIL
Where would I find the Philosophy
section?
LIBRARIAN
Down and to the left, 600's.
Phil walks through the stacks, past the groundhog window.
CUT TO:

EXT. A HOUSE - DAY
Phil rings the doorbell. A kindly young woman, MARY, answers
MARY
Yes?
PHIL
I ' d like a piano lesson, please.
-100-

MARY
Oh. Okay, I ' m with a student
now, but —
PHIL
I'll give you a thousand dollars.
Mary hesitates only a moment, then ushers Phil into the house
and closes the door.
A moment later the door opens and a LITTLE GIRL with an armloa
of music books exits as if pushed. The door closes behind her.
CUT TO:

INT. HALLWAY - DAWN
Phil walks happily down the hallway. He passes the chubby man.
CHUBBY MAN
Morning.
PHIL
Buon Giorno, signore.
/ : '.. '•-
CHUBBY MAN
Think it ' 11 be an early Spring?
PHIL
"Winter slumbering in the open
air wears on his smiling face a
dream of Spring."
CHUBBY MAN
Oh.
CUT TO :

INT. MARY'S HOUSE - DAY
Phil and Mary are sitting together at the piano. Phil is
playing, poorly.
MARY
Not bad, Mr. Connors. You say
this is your first lesson?
PHIL
Technically, yes.
Phil plays on, definitely improving.
CUT TO:
-101-


INT. LIBRARY - DAY
We see several cuts of Phil studying at the library.
SUPERED over these cuts is a calendar with the pages flipping
by. They all read "February 2 . "
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
Phil stands in front of the camera, giving his report.
PHIL
In fact, the groundhog's
legendary ability to predict the
weather may be more than just the
German folklore of the region.
Higher temperatures trigger
hormonal changes in the
testosterone levels of male
groundhogs, which may in fact
wake them from hibernation and
send them out to battle with
other males ;for mating rights.
So, the truth is they're not
looking for their shadows,
they're looking for groundhog
chicks.
Rita looks on, clearly delighted with the report.
CUT TO:

INT. MARY'S HOUSE - DAY
Phil is playing the piano with ever increasing skill as more
February 2 calendar pages flip by.
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
Phil is delivering another report.
-102-

PHIL
Groundhog Day, February second,
also known as Candlemas Day or
the Feast of the Purification of
the Virgin Mary, the day Mary
first came to the temple for
ritual blessings following the
birth of the infant Jesus, and
celebrated since the Middle Ages
by the sacramental lighting of
candles. Hence the old Scottish
couplet which long predates the
.American groundhog tradition: "If
Candlemas dawns bright and clear,
there'll be two winters in the
year."
Larry whispers an aside to Rita.
LARRY
Is he making this stuff up?
RITA
(riveted)
Shhhhh.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary Phil brings coffee and helps Rita and Larry set up for the Groundhog Day event. He engages in various activities, showcasing his knowledge of the holiday and providing comic relief with his antics.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive elements
  • Occasional tonal shifts
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of direction or purpose, as Phil's interactions with Rita and Larry seem disjointed and random.
  • The dialogue feels forced and unnatural, especially Phil's sudden interest in philosophy and piano lessons.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth or character development in this scene, making it difficult for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The transitions between different locations and activities are abrupt and jarring, leading to a disjointed narrative flow.
  • The scene fails to build on the previous events and character dynamics, missing an opportunity to deepen the relationships and conflicts.
Suggestions
  • Focus on developing a clear objective or goal for Phil in this scene to drive the narrative forward.
  • Ensure that the dialogue feels authentic and serves to reveal more about the characters and their motivations.
  • Introduce more emotional depth and character growth by exploring the internal struggles and conflicts of Phil and Rita.
  • Smooth out the transitions between different locations and activities to create a more cohesive and engaging narrative.
  • Use this scene as an opportunity to build on the existing relationships and conflicts, adding depth and complexity to the story.



Scene 27 -  Philosophical Reflections in a Winter Cemetery
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 8
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. CEMETERY - DAY
Beyond the graveyard is a work shed with various tombstones
scattered about. Old TUCKER, the town stonecarver, is at work
chiseling a name into a gravemarker.
Behind him, Phil is chipping away at a small hunk of marble,
sculpting a very lovely cherub.
Rita sits on a stool eating an apple and sipping hot tea
watching him with amazed interest.
PHIL
But what if the rules changed?
What if none of your actions had
consequences?
RITA
There would still be an absolute
morality. There has to be an
absolute good, regardless of the
circumstances.
PHIL
Oh, is that so, Miss Plato? Then
let me ask you this. Where does
this "absolute good" come from?
From the sky?
-103-

Rita shrugs.
RITA
I don't know. From my freshman
Philosophy course, I guess.
They both laugh. Then she looks at him for a long moment and
grins.
PHIL
What?
RITA
Nothing. I just can't believe
you're such a fine sculptor.
Phil takes a bite of her apple and gets up.
PHIL
I gotta go.
RITA
Where do you have to go in
Punxsutawney?
PHIL
I got piano and then drums.
RITA
Here?
PHIL
Come on, I'll drop you off.
They exit.
CUT TO:

EXT. MAIN STREET '••-.. LATER
Phil drops Rita off and watches as she crosses the street to
Larry who is waiting on the other side.
Across the street, Rita takes a wistful glance toward Phil,
then gets in the news van and drives off.
Phil gets out of the car and starts walking, but finds himself
face to face with Ned Ryerson.
NED
Phil! Phil Connors! I thought
that was you!
PHIL
Ned? Ned Ryerson! I don't
believe it. I've missed you so
much.
-104-

Phil gives Ned a big hug and keeps holding on for an
uncomfortably long time, actually giving Ned a hickey on the
neck. Ned goes into homophobic shock.
NED
Uh, I gotta get going. Nice to
see you, Phil.
He hurries off.
CUT TO:

INT. MARY'S HOUSE - DAY
Phil is sitting on the piano bench with Mary, playing pretty
well. Mary is astonished.
MARY
How long have you been studying,
Mr. Connors?
PHIL
One day. I'm gifted.
CUT TO:

EXT. STREET - DAY
Phil is walking down the street. He glances down the alley as
he passes, stops, walks back and enters the alley. The OLD BUM
that Phil never noticed before is lying there, huddled against
a wall. Phil goes to help him.
PHIL
Hey, mister. Hey. Come on,
let's get you somewhere warm.
The old bum turns to look at Phil, then closes his eyes.
PHIL
(helps the old man to
his feet)
There you go.
Phil practically carries him out of the alley.
CUT TO:

INT. HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM - NIGHT
A nurse approaches Phil.
NURSE
You the one brought in the old
man?
-105-

PHIL
How is he?
NURSE
He passed away just now.
Phil pauses for a long moment.
PHIL
What'd he die of?
NURSE
(shrugs)
He was just old. It was his
time.
PHIL
I want to see his chart. Excuse
me.
Phil brushes past her and makes for the big double doors
leading to triage.
NURSE
Sir, you can't —
(hurrying after him)
Look! Some people just die!
PHIL
Not on my watch.
CUT TO:

INT. DINER - MORNING
Phil is propping up the old man at a table, trying to feed him
hot soup.
CUT TO:

INT. HOSPITAL - DAY
Phil is furiously looking over X-rays, flipping through medical
journals and making notes.
CUT TO:

EXT. ALLEY - NIGHT
Phil is in the alley, shaking the old man, trying to rouse him.
PHIL
Come on . Hang on . Hang on ,
there . Breathe .
-106-

Phil stops. The body lies, unmoving. Phil sits back,
breathing heavily.
CUT TO:

EXT. GOBBLER'S KNOB - DAWN
Phil is delivering his report. Everyone there is silent and
listening to Phil. Even the other reporters have turned their
cameras on him.
PHIL
...When Chekhov saw the long
winter, it was a winter bleak and
dark and bereft of hope; and yet,
we know winter's only one more
step in the cycle. And standing
among the people of Punxsutawney —
(Phil looks directly at
Rita)
— basking in the warmth of their
hearths and hearts, I couldn't
imagine a better fate than a long
and lustrous winter.
Phil smiles. Rita smiles, too.
PHIL
For Channel 9 news, I ' m Phil
Connors.
There is much applause. Even Larry brushes away a tear.
Phil hands the microphone to Rita.
RITA
Phil—
PHIL
Sorry. I'm gonna be late.
Phil rushes off.
RITA
Late for what? Phil?
(To Larry)
Could you break it down and wrap
out of here by yourself, Larry?
LARRY
Sure .
RITA
Thanks .
-107-

Rita rushes off after Phil.
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Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary In a serene cemetery, reporter Phil, producer Rita, and stonecarver Tucker engage in deep conversations about life, morality, and the meaning of existence. Phil's encounter with a dying bum leads him on a quest to understand his death, inspiring a poignant speech about living in the moment and embracing the beauty of winter.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Thought-provoking themes
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Some dialogue may be overly philosophical
Critique
  • The scene in the cemetery lacks a clear direction and purpose, with the conversation between Phil and Rita feeling forced and lacking depth.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita about morality and absolute good comes across as contrived and doesn't add much to the scene.
  • The transition between different locations and interactions feels abrupt and disjointed, making it hard for the audience to follow the flow of the scene.
  • The emotional impact of the old man's death and Phil's subsequent actions is not fully explored or developed, leaving the audience disconnected from the character's motivations.
  • The scene lacks a cohesive theme or central conflict, making it feel disjointed and lacking in narrative depth.
Suggestions
  • Focus on developing a clear central conflict or theme for the scene to give it more depth and purpose.
  • Work on improving the dialogue between Phil and Rita to make it more natural and engaging, with a focus on character development and emotional depth.
  • Consider restructuring the scene to create a more cohesive narrative flow, with smoother transitions between locations and interactions.
  • Explore the emotional impact of the old man's death and Phil's actions in more depth to create a stronger connection with the audience.
  • Consider revisiting the scene to add more depth and complexity to the interactions between the characters, as well as a clearer sense of direction and purpose.



Scene 28 -  The Good Samaritan
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 7
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. STREET CORNER - DAY
Phil walks briskly toward an intersection, glancing nervously
at his watch. Rita follows him at a distance, hurrying to keep
up.
MARIE, a little nine-year-old girl, approaches the intersection
shielding her brand new puppy under her winter coat. She isn't
paying attention to traffic and fails to notice a big truck
bearing down on her.
As she steps off the curb, Phil arrives and, with split-second
timing, nonchalantly but firmly grabs her coat to hold her
back, just as the big truck rushes past in the street, narrowly
missing her.
PHIL
Hey! Did you forget to look both
ways? You didn't even look one
way.
MARIE
My doggie was cold.
PHIL
Yeah, well, my doggies are
freezing, but I ' m still gonna
watch out for cars. See you
around, kid.
Phil looks at his watch and rushes off.
Rita looks on amazed and follows him at a distance.
CUT TO:

INT. BERGHOF RESTAURANT - DAY
Phil enters the crowded restaurant and pushes past all the
people waiting to be seated. He walks casually but quickly and
purposefully around the tables, squeezing past busy waitresses
and seated patrons toward a commotion in the back of the
restaurant.
TWO BUSINESSMEN are leaning over a THIRD.
BUSINESSMAN
Oh, my God! He's having a heart
attack!
SECOND BUSINESSMAN
Lay him down!
-108-

BUSINESSMAN
What do I do? He's not
breathing1
SECOND BUSINESSMAN
He's turning blue! Help!
Phil walks straight up to the BLUE-FACED MAN, grabs him from
behind, gets him in the Heimlich grip and squeezes sharply.
A bolus of food flies across the room. The victim coughs and
sputters, then starts breathing again.
FIRST BUSINESSMAN
Jerry, you okay?
SECOND BUSINESSMAN
I think that did it.
Phil lets go of the grateful victim.
PHIL
If you're going to eat steak, get
better teeth, will you? Enjoy
the rest of your lunch, gents.
He exits.
JERRY
Wow. Who was that guy?
Phil gets to the door and finds Rita standing there, looking at
him in awe.
PHIL
Rita!
.RITA
(confronting)
-Okay, hold it right there. I
want to know what' s going on and
I want to know right now.
PHIL
I'm sorry, I'm really pressed
right now. Meet me outside the
hospital about 5:00 and we'll
talk about it.
RITA
The hospital?
Phil looks at his watch and rushes away.
PHIL
Try the curlycue fries. Killer.
CUT TO:
-109-

INT. HOSPITAL CORRIDOR - LATER
A gurney bursts through the double doors, paramedics and nurses
in attendance. The patient is a teenage girl, JANEY, totally
unconscious.

INT. EMERGENCY ROOM - CONTINUOUS
The gurney is wheeled into the surgery.
NURSE
Looks like insulin shock. She's
probably diabetic.
Phil enters wearing a doctor's scrub suit and begins barking
orders.
PHIL
She's not diabetic. It's an
overdose. Let's get her up here
and pump her stomach, then I want
a complete blood work-up, STAT.
NURSE
Right, Doctor—uh—
She realizes she's never seen him before.
PHIL
Call me Phil.
NURSE
Phil. Like the groundhog?
PHIL
Exactly.
CUT TO:

INT. CHILDREN'S WARD - LATE AFTERNOON
Sick CHILDREN in hospital gowns are gathered around Phil,
laughing and squealing. Phil is. making balloon animals.
KID
Make a giraffe!
PHIL
A giraffe? Let's see. It's just
like a dog with a biiiiig— what
was it?
ALL THE KIDS
Neck!
-110-

PHIL
A big tail? Okay, a big tail.
KIDS
Neck! A big neck!
Phil makes an animal really quickly.
Rita watches from the doorway, unseen by Phil.
PHIL
There. A dog with long legs.
KIDS
Nooo ! Long neck !
PHIL
Oh! Right! A dog with a big
head.
KIDS
Noooo!
The kids attack Phil. Lots of rolling around on the bed. Rita
watches, completely enthralled.
Finally, Phil extricates himself and exits to find Rita
waiting.
RITA
All right, now what's going on?
PHIL
(taking her arm)
Come on. We have to hurry.
CUT TO:

EXT. RESIDENTIAL STREET - A LITTLE LATER
Phil rushes down the sidewalk with Rita close behind him. He
stops under a tree and puts his arms out just as a YOUNG BOY
falls out of the tree and into his arms, knocking him to the
ground. The kid runs off unhurt as Phil gets back to his feet
and brushes himself off.
PHIL
(to Rita)
That little bastard has never
thanked me once . I ought to j ust
let him fall. Teach him a
lesson.
RITA
Phil, this is too — I must be
dreaming.
-111-

PHIL
Yeah, you and me both. Come on,
We're almost done.
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Genres: ["Drama","Comedy"]

Summary Phil, a mysterious man, makes a habit of saving people in need. Without expecting anything in return, he saves a little girl from being hit by a truck, a choking man in a restaurant, a teenage girl from an overdose in a hospital, makes balloon animals for sick children, and catches a boy who falls out of a tree. A woman named Rita, curious about Phil's motives, follows him and demands an explanation.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some scenes may feel rushed or disjointed
Critique
  • The scene starts off with a heroic moment where Phil saves a little girl from being hit by a truck, which is a good way to showcase his character development.
  • The subsequent scenes where Phil saves a choking man, a teenage girl from an overdose, makes balloon animals for sick children, and catches a boy falling out of a tree, all highlight Phil's transformation from a selfish and cynical person to someone who genuinely cares about others.
  • The interactions with the business men and the blue-faced man add a touch of humor and action to the scene, showcasing Phil's quick thinking and resourcefulness.
  • The scene with the teenage girl in the hospital adds depth to Phil's character as he takes charge and demonstrates medical knowledge, showing a different side of him.
  • The balloon animal scene with the children adds a heartwarming touch and shows Phil's playful and caring side.
  • Rita's reactions throughout the scene help to emphasize the impact of Phil's actions and his growth as a character.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal conflict for Phil to make his transformation more impactful. Show his struggle with his newfound sense of responsibility and empathy.
  • Explore the emotional impact of Phil's actions on the people he saves. Show their gratitude and how it affects them.
  • Consider adding more depth to Rita's character in this scene. Show her reactions and thoughts more explicitly to highlight the impact of Phil's actions on her.
  • Ensure a smooth transition between the different scenarios to maintain the flow of the scene.
  • Consider adding a reflective moment for Phil after each rescue to show his growth and introspection.



Scene 29 -  Nightly Vigil
  • Overall: 8.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 7
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 7
EXT. ALLEY - NIGHT
Phil kneels on the cold ground beside the old bum who lies
huddled against the wall, immobile.
Rita is standing by at the end of the alley, watching as Phil
examines him.
Phil writes something down on a small pad. He finishes, and
sets it down by the old man. Then he takes his coat and uses
it to cover the man up. A siren is heard.
Phil stands and walks away, as an ambulance pulls into the
alley.
RITA
Is he — ?
. 'PHIL
Yeah. Let's go.
RITA
In a minute.
She waits and watches.
The paramedics, BUD and ANDY, get out of the ambulance and
inspect the scene.
BUD
It's ol1 Really.
ANDY
That's a shame.
BUD
Look here .
Bud picks up the note Phil left.
Rita steps closer.
RITA
May I see that?
(reading aloud)
"Every night, by cold bricks
glow
I watch the shadow rising
from this old man in the snow.
At 8:02 we let it go."
-112-

ANDY
(repeating)
"At 8:02 we let it go."
BUD
Wow, that's nice.
Rita hands him the note and quickly walks away.
ANDY
Suppose he wrote it?
BUD
(doubtful)
Are you kidding?
CUT TO:

EXT. MAIN STREET - NIGHT
Rita catches up with Phil outside the Pennsylvanian, the town's
oldest and best hotel.
RITA
Now what?
PHIL
Come on. You'll see.
They enter.
CUT TO :

INT. HOTEL LOBBY - CONTINUOUS
As Phil and Rita enter there is music coming from a side room.
The black velvet announcement board proclaims: KLEISER-SCOTT
WEDDING.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Drama","Romance","Mystery"]

Summary Phil discovers an elderly homeless man in an alley and provides assistance. Paramedics arrive and a note left by Phil is revealed, evoking a somber reflection on the man's situation. Phil and a woman named Rita, who witnessed the scene, later meet outside a hotel hosting a wedding.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Mystery element
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Limited action
Critique
  • The scene lacks clarity in terms of the significance of the note left by Phil for the old bum. The poetic nature of the note is intriguing but may be confusing for the audience without further context or explanation.
  • The transition from the alley to the hotel lobby feels abrupt and disjointed. There is a lack of smooth continuity in the scene progression.
  • The emotional impact of the old bum's situation and Phil's actions could be heightened with more depth and exploration of their relationship or connection.
  • The dialogue between Rita, Bud, and Andy at the end of the scene feels somewhat forced and unnatural, detracting from the authenticity of the moment.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the themes of compassion, mortality, and human connection that are hinted at in the scene.
Suggestions
  • Provide more context or backstory to explain the significance of the note left by Phil for the old bum, perhaps through a flashback or internal monologue.
  • Smooth out the transition between the alley and the hotel lobby to create a more cohesive flow in the scene.
  • Explore the emotional dynamics between Phil, Rita, and the old bum to add depth and resonance to their interactions.
  • Refine the dialogue between Rita, Bud, and Andy to make it more organic and realistic, enhancing the authenticity of the scene.
  • Consider expanding on the themes of compassion, mortality, and human connection to create a more impactful and meaningful scene.



Scene 30 -  Wedding Reception Surprise
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 9
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
INT. PARTY ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Phil and Rita walk into a banquet room decorated with
streamers, balloons and flowers. There is a long buffet table
and a punch bowl. Another long table is loaded with wedding
gifts. A small band is playing.
People are dancing. The wedding party is dressed in rented
tuxedos and appropriately pouffy bridesmaid dresses.
RITA
This is incredible. Who's
wedding is this?
-113-

Phil grabs two glasses of champagne and hands one to Rita.
PHIL
Just some friends. Dorisi
The bride, DORIS, young and cheery, is on her way to see Phil.
She is dragging FRED, her groom, with her.
DORIS
Hi, Mr. Connors! Come ON,
Freddy.
FRED
Hi.
DORIS
This is the guy I told you about.
FRED
No way!
PHIL
How's it going, Fred?
FRED
Hey, I ' d like to thank you for
making Doris go through with
this.
PHIL
Are you kidding? Don't buy that
playing hard to get stuff. She's
crazy about you, you stud.
DORIS
I 'm really glad you could come.
PHIL
Congratulations.
Phil reaches into his pocket, pulls out two tickets and hands
them to Doris.
DORIS
What is this? Oh, no way! No
way! Ahhh!
Doris throws herself on Fred and jumps up and down. Fred grabs
the tickets.
FRED
Wrestlemania! No way! No way!
Doris throws herself on Phil.
DORIS
How did you know?
-114-

FRED
We're like going to be in
Pittsburgh anyway.
PHIL
I don't know. I just thought
about you two, tried to picture
what you ' d want more than
anything in the world and it came
to me. Bing! Wrestlemania.
FRED
Thanks, Mr. Connors. You're a
real pal.
DORIS
This is the best!
Doris gives Phil a kiss. She and Fred move on.
RITA
I don ' t understand . You rush
from one person to the next in a
town you only visit once a year,
you know everything before it
happens , and you — - I don ' t know ,
you seem to be Punxsutawney ' s
leading citizen.
The band finishes a set. The guests stop dancing and head for
the refreshments. Phil and Rita are left alone for the moment
PHIL
What do you want to know?
RITA
Who are you?
PHIL
I really don't know.
RITA
No, there's something going on
with you.
PHIL
Okay, I wake up in Punxsutawney
on February second — every day.
It's supernatural. I don't even
try to explain it anymore. So,
I live each day as if it's the
only day I've got.
Rita stares into his eyes for a very long time, but sees only
good, true things.
RITA
That's pretty amazing. "
-115-

PHIL
You want to know what's really
amazing? I've been waiting for
you every day for ten thousand
years. I dream of you every
night of my life. You've been my
constant weapon against total
despair, and just knowing you
exist has kept me alive. How's
that?
Rita can't even speak. This is clearly the nicest thing
anybody has ever said to anybody.
Mary the piano teacher notices Phil.
MARY
Phil!
(to her friend)
This is the guy.
PHIL
Hello, Mary. Rita, this is one
of Punxsey's finest musicians.
•MARY
Give me a break. You should
talk. Why don't you play
something?
PHIL
No, I—
MARY
Please.
FRED
Hey, Mr. Connors. Go for it.
Phil looks at Rita. She nods and shrugs.
Phil walks up to the platform and sits at the piano. He begins
to play a slow, serious, classical piece. Everyone falls
silent. It's so beautiful, Rita is almost in tears.
Then, after a pause to let the serious notes sink in, Phil
transforms the piece into a fast, lively, upbeat jazz romp.
Everyone is delighted, and as the rest of the band kicks in,
everyone grabs a partner and begins to dance.
An old coot, UNCLE LEO, grabs Rita and the two of them dance up
a storm.
LEO
That's a great guy you've got
there. Doctor Connors fixed my
back, you know.
- -116-


RITA
Doctor Connors?

Rita looks over at Phil, joyously playing the piano.

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Genres: ["Romance","Comedy","Drama"]

Summary At a joyous wedding reception, Phil and Rita engage in heartfelt conversations, surprising the newlyweds with Wrestlemania tickets. Phil's piano performance captivates the guests, showcasing his musical talent amidst the celebration.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Romantic tension
Weaknesses
  • Limited external conflict
  • Some predictable elements
Critique
  • The scene at the wedding reception feels a bit rushed and lacks depth in terms of character development and emotional impact.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita, while heartfelt, could benefit from more subtlety and nuance to make their connection feel more authentic.
  • The transition from Phil revealing his supernatural experience to playing the piano and impressing everyone feels a bit abrupt and could be smoother.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional complexity of Phil's situation and his relationship with Rita.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the atmosphere and setting of the wedding reception.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more layers to the interaction between Phil and Rita to make their connection more believable and impactful.
  • Provide more context and background information about the wedding couple, Doris and Fred, to make their interactions with Phil more meaningful.
  • Explore Phil's supernatural experience and its impact on his emotional state in more depth to add complexity to his character.
  • Slow down the pacing of the scene to allow for more emotional resonance and character development.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the wedding reception to create a more immersive and vivid setting for the scene.



Scene 31 -  A New Beginning
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 8
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. STREET - NIGHT

It is snowing lightly. Phil and Rita are walking slowly, arm
in arm, close. They stop and embrace. Phil looks at Rita.
She looks like an angel.

PHIL
Wait! Don't move!

Phil scoops up some snow and begins packing it down, furiously,
joyously, then rolling it into a large ball.

RITA
Making a snow man? I'll help.

PHIL
No, stay there. Stand right
there.

Phil lifts the now larger chunk of packed snow and sets it on
a mailbox. Then he looks at her, and starts to sculpt it.

DISSOLVE TO:

LATER

Phil is using a stick and the heat of his bare hands to model
a delicate fold in the snow sculpture. Several bystanders look
on with interest as Phil stands back from his work.

RITA
Can I look?

PHIL
Okay, look.

It is an excellent likeness of Rita, the snow white as
alabaster, pure as marble, a beautiful and delicate homage.

RITA
(overwhelmed)
Nobody's ever done this for me.
Not even a drawing. It's
beautiful.
-117-

PHIL
This is how I see you. When it
all gets too much, I just close
my eyes and there you are— just
like this. Take it home and keep
it in the freezer.
Rita embraces Phil. They are about to kiss, looking deep into
each others eyes.
PHIL
This one's for the Frog Prince.
RITA
What?
PHIL
Nothing.
They kiss— a long, deep, soul-stirring kiss.
PHIL
Will you come with me?
Rita nods. They continue standing there, embracing, warming
each other in the cold night air.
RITA
(looks back at the ice
sculpture)
We're just going to leave her?
PHIL
It doesn't matter. Really, it
doesn't.
They kiss again.
CUT TO:
CLOSE UP - THE CLOCK
The digital clock-radio changes from 5:59 to 6:00. Silence.
No Sonny and Cher, no deejays— nothing.
Phil sits up in bed. He looks around the room. Things are
different, messier. Then he sees the covers move. Wide-eyed
now, he looks over and sees Rita waking up, snuggling deep
under the covers.
PHIL
(disbelieving)
It's not true. It's not. It
can't be true. Rita? Rita!
-118-

RITA
(stretching
luxuriously)
Mmmm. Morning.
Phil pounces on Rita, showering her with kisses.
PHIL
You're here! My god! I can't
believe you're here!
RITA
Glad to see you, too.
PHIL
No! It's happened. Don't you
get it? It's tomorrow! It's —
Phil turns on the radio.
DEEJAY
. . . still shoveling put the
highways, but if you're walking,
it's a beautiful day.
SIDEKICK
Yeah, the snow kind of cleaned
everything up—
DEEJAY
—except your mouth.
Phil kisses the radio.
PHIL
I love those guys.
RITA
Are you always this jolly in the
morning?
Phil runs to the window and looks out.
HIS POV - THE STREET
The street ;is virtually empty, the town just waking up. Kids
are throwing snowballs.
PHIL
No groundhog! Rita! They're all
gone!
RITA
You must've had some dream.
Phil stops, thinks.
-1 1 9 -

PHIL
Did I just dream it?
Phil opens the door and runs into the hallway wearing only
pajama bottoms.
RITA
Phil? Phil!
Rita sits up in bed and waits. Suddenly, from somewhere else
in the inn comes the sound of Phil at the piano expertly
playing a difficult classical piece. He stops after a few
bars.
PHIL (O.C.)
Yeah!!!!
Phil runs back into the room.
PHIL
It really happened! You're
really here!
He pounces on Rita again.
PHIL
You're really actually here.
RITA
(laughing)
I'm here, I'm here!
They kiss, passionately, hungrily.
PHIL
Let's go!
He scoops her up in his arms.
RITA
Where're we going?
PHIL
Anywhere! Everywhere!
CUT TO:

INT. BREAKFAST ROOM - LATER
Phil and Rita, dressed now, enter and encounter Mrs. Lancaster
Phil hugs her.
MRS. LANCASTER
Oh, my!
-120-

PHIL
Florence! Say hello to Rita.
She loves me.
MRS. LANCASTER
I'm not surprised.
He kisses her on the cheek and rushes out with Rita.
Genres: ["Romance","Drama","Fantasy"]

Summary Phil and Rita share a romantic moment on a snowy street, with Phil sculpting a snow statue of Rita to express his love. They share a deep kiss, and Phil realizes the time loop has ended when it's the next day. The scene ends with Phil and Rita excitedly planning to go anywhere and everywhere together, indicating a new beginning for their relationship.
Strengths
  • Romantic atmosphere
  • Authentic character interactions
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Minimal conflict
  • Limited external action
Critique
  • The scene captures a beautiful moment of connection and intimacy between Phil and Rita, but it could benefit from more depth and emotional complexity.
  • The transition from the snow sculpture to the morning after feels a bit abrupt and could be smoother to enhance the flow of the scene.
  • There is a lack of buildup or foreshadowing to the moment of realization that the time loop has ended, which could make the resolution feel more impactful.
  • The dialogue between Phil and Rita, while sweet, could be more nuanced and reflective of the emotional journey they have been on throughout the screenplay.
  • The scene could explore the themes of redemption, forgiveness, and personal growth more deeply to add layers to the characters' development.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a flashback or reflection moment to show the audience the significance of the snow sculpture and its connection to Phil and Rita's relationship.
  • Enhance the transition between the snow sculpture scene and the morning after by incorporating subtle visual cues or emotional cues to signal the shift in time.
  • Build up the moment of realization that the time loop has ended by planting subtle hints or clues throughout the screenplay leading up to this pivotal moment.
  • Revise the dialogue between Phil and Rita to delve deeper into their emotional journey, addressing themes of growth, forgiveness, and love in a more profound way.
  • Explore opportunities to add layers to the characters' development by incorporating moments of introspection, vulnerability, and growth within the scene.



Scene 32 -  Phil and Rita's Celebration on Main Street
  • Overall: 9.0
  • Concept: 8
  • Plot: 9
  • Characters: 9
  • Dialogue: 8
EXT. THE STREET - DAY
Phil and Rita walk down Main Street hand in hand.
A MAN
Phil! Good morning!
A LADY
Mr. Connors. I wanted to thank
you.
PHIL
That's all right. I—
A FLORIST steps out of the flower shop with a bouquet.
FLORIST
Phil, here. I want you to have
these.
PHIL
Thanks, Carl.
Phil smells the flowers, and hands the bouquet to Rita.
PHIL (V.O.)
And so began my final lifetime,
and ended the longest winter on
record. I would find myself no
longer able to affect the chain
of events in this town, but I did
learn something about time. You
can waste time, you can kill
time, you can do time, but if you
use it wisely, there's never
enough of it. So you'd better
make the most of the time you've
got.
A car skids on the ice and smashes into a tree. Phil and Rita
rush over to help, but the driver waves that he's okay. Rita
and Phil continue their walk.
-121-

PHIL (V.O.)
Larry never got through the
blizzard, so none of my groundhog
reports ever made it on the air.
But Rita and I— we lived happily
ever after.
Phil and Rita walk off together.
Across the street, Larry is trying to get rid of Ned Ryerson
who is doggedly trying to sell him insurance.
NED
But Phil told me you were his
accountant!
LARRY
Look, I told you! He's nuts!
Larry keeps trying to walk away, but Ned won't leave him alone.
NED
Let me just tell you about single
premium life—
Finally, Larry slugs Ned and storms off, leaving Ned
floundering in a snowbank.
Phil and Rita walk on as we pull up and away from Main Street
revealing the whole of Punxsutawney and the snowy countryside
that embraces it.
THE END
Genres: ["Romance","Comedy","Drama"]

Summary Phil and Rita stroll down Main Street, greeted by the townsfolk and receiving a bouquet from the florist. Phil reflects on using time wisely and the memory of Larry, who tragically perished in the blizzard but whose memory remains as they live happily ever after. Meanwhile, across the street, Ned Ryerson's persistent attempts to sell insurance to Larry lead to a violent confrontation, with Larry punching Ned.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Romantic resolution
Weaknesses
  • Limited external conflict
  • Predictable resolution
Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear resolution to Phil's character arc. While it hints at a new beginning for Phil and Rita's relationship, it doesn't fully address Phil's growth or the lessons he has learned throughout the time loop.
  • The dialogue feels a bit rushed and lacks depth, especially in the interactions with the townsfolk. More meaningful conversations or interactions could add emotional depth to the scene.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the setting and atmosphere. Adding details about the snowy street, the flower shop, and the interactions with the townsfolk could create a more vivid picture for the audience.
  • The ending feels a bit abrupt and could be more impactful with a stronger emotional payoff. Phil's reflections on time and the lessons he has learned could be more explicitly tied to his actions and interactions in the scene.
  • There is a missed opportunity to further explore Phil's transformation and how his experiences in the time loop have shaped his perspective on life. This could add depth and resonance to the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of reflection for Phil where he explicitly acknowledges his growth and the impact of the time loop on his character.
  • Enhance the dialogue to include more meaningful exchanges between Phil, Rita, and the townsfolk, adding depth to their interactions.
  • Provide more detailed visual descriptions to create a richer and more immersive setting for the scene.
  • Revise the ending to provide a more satisfying conclusion to Phil and Rita's story, tying back to Phil's reflections on time and the lessons he has learned.
  • Explore Phil's emotional journey more deeply, showing how his experiences have shaped his newfound perspective on life and relationships.