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Scene 1 -  Echoes of the Past
COCO




Original Story By
Lee Unkrich, Jason Katz, Matthew Aldrich, Adrian Molina


Screenplay By
Adrian Molina and Matthew Aldrich


EXT. MARIGOLD PATH - DUSK

A path of marigold petals leads up to an altar lovingly
arranged in a humble cemetery. An old woman lights a candle
as the smoke of burning copal wood dances lyrically upward...

CARD: DISNEY PRESENTS

CARD: A PIXAR ANIMATION STUDIOS FILM

The smoke lifts up toward lines of papel picado –- cut paper
banners -- that sway gently in the breeze.

PAPEL PICADO CARD: "COCO"

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Sometimes I think I'm cursed...
'cause of something that happened
before I was even born.

A story begins to play out on the papel picado.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
See, a long time ago there was this
family.

The images on the papel picado come to life to illustrate a
father, a mother, and a little girl. The family is happy.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
The papá, he was a musician.

The papá plays guitar while the mother dances with her
daughter.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
He and his family would sing, and
dance, and count their blessings...
(beat)
But he also had a dream... to play
for the world.
(beat)
And one day he left with his
guitar... and never returned.

The man walks down a road, guitar slung on his back. In
another vignette his daughter stands in the doorway, watching
her papá leave. Two feet step up next to her. It is her
mamá, hardened.

She shuts the door.




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MIGUEL (V.O.)
And the mamá...? She didn't have
time to cry over that walkaway
musician!
(beat)
After banishing all music from her
life...

The woman gets rid of all of her husband's instruments and
records.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
She found a way to provide for her
daughter...
(beat)
She rolled up her sleeves and she
learned to make shoes.
(beat)
She could have made candy!

Amongst the papel picado, a stick swings at a strung up
piñata which bursts with candy...

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Or fireworks!

Fireworks go off in the background...

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Or sparkly underwear for wrestlers!

Sparkly underwear and a luchador mask hang on a line amongst
other linens...

MIGUEL (V.O.)
But no... she chose shoes...

On the papel picado, the little girl becomes a young woman.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Then she taught her daughter to
make shoes. And later, she taught
her son-in-law.

She introduces a suitor to the family business.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Then her grandkids got roped in.
As her family grew, so did the
business.

In the next vignette, a bunch of goofy grandchildren join in
the shoemaking. The shoe shop is full of family!



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MIGUEL (V.O.)
Music had torn her family apart,
but shoes held them all together.
(beat)
You see, that woman was my great-
great grandmother, Mamá Imelda.

TILT DOWN from the papel picado to the


OFRENDA ROOM - DAY

where a photo sits at the top of a beautiful altar. The
photo features MAMÁ IMELDA -- serious, formidable. She holds
a baby on her lap. Her husband stands beside her, but his
face has been torn away.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
She died WAY before I was born.
But my family still tells her story
every year on Día de los Muertos --
the Day of the Dead...
(beat)
And her little girl?

Fade from the face of the little girl to present day MAMÁ
COCO (97), a living raisin, convalescing in a wicker
wheelchair.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
She's my great grandmother, Mamá
Coco.

A boy (12) walks into frame and kisses her on the cheek.
This is our narrator, MIGUEL.

MIGUEL
Holá, Mamá Coco.

MAMÁ COCO
How are you, Julio?

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Actually, my name is Miguel. Mamá
Coco has trouble remembering
things... But it's good to talk to
her anyway. So I tell her pretty
much everything.

QUICK CUTS of Miguel with Mamá Coco:




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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a cemetery adorned with marigold petals, Miguel narrates his family's history, recounting how his great-great-grandmother, Mamá Imelda, banned music after her husband left to pursue his dreams. Through animated papel picado, the family's transition from joy to hardship is illustrated, highlighting Mamá Imelda's dedication to shoemaking. The scene shifts to present day, where Miguel interacts with his elderly great-grandmother, Mamá Coco, emphasizing their bond despite her forgetfulness. The tone is nostalgic and bittersweet, setting the stage for Miguel's relationship with music and family legacy.
Strengths
  • Creative use of papel picado
  • Emotional storytelling
  • Strong character introductions
Weaknesses
  • Limited action or external conflict
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes the backstory and introduces key characters while setting a reflective and nostalgic tone. The use of papel picado as a storytelling device is innovative and engaging.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using papel picado to tell the family history is unique and engaging. The scene effectively introduces the themes of family, legacy, and the power of music and shoes in shaping the characters' lives.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene focuses on establishing the family history and setting up the central conflict around music and shoes. It effectively introduces the characters and their motivations, setting the stage for the rest of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on family, tradition, and memory through the lens of Mexican culture and the Day of the Dead tradition. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and grounded in their cultural context.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are introduced with depth and complexity, especially Mamá Imelda and Miguel. Their relationships and motivations are clearly established, setting up potential character arcs and conflicts.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the groundwork is laid for potential growth and development for characters like Miguel and Mamá Imelda.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to understand and connect with his family's history and traditions, particularly the story of his great-great grandmother, Mamá Imelda.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to care for and communicate with his great grandmother, Mamá Coco, who struggles with memory loss.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is more internal and emotional, focusing on the family's history and the choices made by Mamá Imelda. It sets up potential conflicts around music and tradition that will unfold later in the story.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and tension, particularly in the protagonist's internal and external goals and the challenges he faces in understanding his family's history.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes in the scene are more emotional and personal, focusing on the family's history and the legacy of Mamá Imelda. While there are no immediate life-or-death stakes, the emotional weight of the story is significant.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by establishing the family history, introducing key characters, and setting up central conflicts and themes that will drive the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces unexpected twists and emotional depth through the protagonist's family history and the challenges they face.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the choices made by the protagonist's ancestors and how they have shaped the family's values and traditions.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, especially in the portrayal of Mamá Imelda's sacrifices and the legacy she leaves behind. The relationships between the characters are heartfelt and poignant.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue serves the purpose of narration and character introduction effectively. It conveys the emotions and relationships between the characters, setting the tone for the rest of the story.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it draws the audience into the protagonist's family history, introduces compelling characters, and sets up emotional conflicts and themes.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension, reveals key information, and establishes emotional connections between the characters and the audience.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character introductions, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear and engaging structure that effectively introduces the protagonist, sets up the family history, and establishes the emotional stakes of the story.


Critique
  • The scene effectively sets the tone and context for the story, introducing the themes of family, memory, and the impact of music on relationships. The use of voiceover from Miguel provides a personal touch, allowing the audience to connect with his perspective.
  • The visual storytelling through papel picado is a creative choice that adds cultural depth and aesthetic appeal. It serves as a beautiful metaphor for the family's history and the passage of time, enhancing the emotional weight of the narrative.
  • However, the pacing could be improved. The transition from the family's joyful past to the hardships faced by Mamá Imelda feels a bit abrupt. A smoother transition could help the audience digest the emotional shift more effectively.
  • While the voiceover is engaging, it occasionally feels expository. Striking a balance between showing and telling could enhance the scene. For instance, instead of stating that music tore the family apart, consider illustrating this through visual cues or actions that depict the family's emotional turmoil.
  • The character of Mamá Imelda is introduced primarily through Miguel's narration. While this establishes her significance, it would be beneficial to see her actions or expressions that reflect her character traits, making her more relatable and complex from the outset.
Suggestions
  • Consider incorporating a brief visual montage that shows the family's joy in music before the father's departure, allowing the audience to feel the loss more profoundly when music is later banished.
  • Add a moment where Mamá Imelda reacts to the father's departure, perhaps through a visual cue or a brief flashback, to provide a deeper emotional connection to her character and her subsequent decisions.
  • To enhance the emotional impact, include a moment where the family gathers around the altar, perhaps sharing a memory or a story about Mamá Imelda, which could serve to deepen the audience's understanding of her legacy.
  • Explore the use of sound design to complement the visuals. For instance, incorporating soft music or ambient sounds that reflect the family's past joy could create a more immersive experience for the audience.



Scene 2 -  Luchadora Coco's Playful Victory
EXT. COURTYARD

MIGUEL
I used to run like this...

Miguel pumps his arms with his hands in fists. Then he
switches to flat palms.

MIGUEL
But now I run like this which is
way faster!

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INT. MAMÁ COCO'S ROOM

Miguel, in a luchador mask, climbs onto the bed, arms raised.

MIGUEL
And the winner is... Luchadora
Coco!

Miguel leaps off the bed onto a pile of pillows that bursts,
sending feathers onto Mamá Coco who wears a mask of her own.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Comedy"]

Summary In this lighthearted scene, Miguel showcases his running style before transitioning to a playful moment in Mamá Coco's room. Wearing a luchador mask, he climbs onto the bed and declares himself Luchadora Coco, leaping onto a pile of pillows and causing feathers to explode into the air. Mamá Coco, also masked, enjoys the chaos, highlighting their joyful bond in a lively family setting.
Strengths
  • Playful interactions between characters
  • Cultural references
  • Emotional connection with the audience
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys a sense of joy and connection between the characters while introducing elements of the family's cultural heritage.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of using luchador masks to playfully interact with Mamá Coco adds depth to the scene and ties in with the family's cultural background.

Plot: 6

While the scene does not significantly advance the main plot, it serves as a moment of bonding between Miguel and Mamá Coco.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on family interactions and cultural traditions, blending humor and heart in a unique way.


Character Development

Characters: 8

Miguel and Mamá Coco are portrayed as loving and playful characters, adding depth to their relationship.

Character Changes: 5

While there is not significant character development in this scene, it showcases the loving relationship between Miguel and Mamá Coco.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to feel a sense of freedom and joy through play and imagination, reflecting his desire for happiness and connection.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to entertain and bond with his family, showcasing his creativity and energy.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 2

There is minimal conflict in the scene, focusing more on the positive relationship between Miguel and Mamá Coco.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is light, adding a sense of challenge and unpredictability without overshadowing the humor.

High Stakes: 2

The stakes are low in this scene, focusing more on the positive interactions between the characters.

Story Forward: 4

The scene does not move the main plot forward significantly but adds depth to the characters' relationship.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists and playful interactions between characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict is between tradition and modernity, as Miguel embraces his love for luchador masks while also honoring his family's heritage.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of joy and nostalgia, creating an emotional connection with the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is light-hearted and playful, reflecting the affectionate relationship between Miguel and Mamá Coco.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its humor, visual gags, and heartwarming family interactions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene enhances its comedic timing and emotional beats, keeping the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, making it easy to visualize the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with distinct locations and character actions, enhancing the narrative flow.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's playful spirit and his bond with Mamá Coco, which is essential for establishing their relationship early in the story. However, the transition from the courtyard to Mamá Coco's room feels abrupt. A smoother transition could enhance the flow of the narrative.
  • The dialogue is minimal, relying heavily on visual storytelling, which works well for a scene focused on action and playfulness. However, adding a line or two of dialogue from Mamá Coco could provide insight into her character and her relationship with Miguel, enriching the emotional depth of the scene.
  • The physical comedy of Miguel's actions, such as the leap onto the pillows, is visually engaging and aligns with the film's overall tone. However, the scene could benefit from a moment of pause after the feathers burst, allowing the audience to absorb the humor and the visual spectacle before moving on.
  • While the scene showcases Miguel's imagination and energy, it lacks a clear emotional or narrative progression. It would be beneficial to tie this playful moment back to the overarching themes of family and music, perhaps by having Miguel express a fleeting thought about music or his dreams before or after the playful antics.
  • The use of the luchador mask is a fun visual element that adds to Miguel's character, but it could be more thematically connected to the story. Consider incorporating a line that reflects Miguel's admiration for luchadores or how they inspire him, linking it back to his aspirations.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of dialogue from Mamá Coco, perhaps a playful remark or a confused response, to deepen her character and enhance the interaction with Miguel.
  • To improve the transition between the courtyard and Mamá Coco's room, consider adding a line of narration or a visual cue that connects the two settings, such as Miguel running through the house or calling out to Mamá Coco as he enters her room.
  • After the feathers burst, allow a moment of silence or a comedic reaction from Mamá Coco before moving on to the next scene. This pause can heighten the humor and give the audience a moment to enjoy the visual gag.
  • Incorporate a line where Miguel reflects on his dreams of music or how he wishes to be as brave as a luchador, tying his playful actions back to the central themes of the story.
  • Consider using the luchador mask as a metaphor for Miguel's aspirations. A line that connects the mask to his dreams of becoming a musician could reinforce the theme of pursuing one's passion despite family expectations.



Scene 3 -  A Family Dinner with Strict Rules
EXT. DINING AREA

Miguel leans toward Mamá Coco at the dinner table.

MIGUEL
I have a dimple on this side, but
not on this side. Dimple. No
dimple. Dimple. No dimple--

ABUELITA
Miguel! Eat your food.

Miguel's ABUELITA (70s) runs the table like a ship captain.
She gives Mamá Coco a kiss on the head.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
My Abuelita? She's Mamá Coco's
daughter.

Abuelita piles extra tamales on Miguel's plate.

ABUELITA
Aw, you're a twig, mijo. Have some
more.



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MIGUEL
No, gracias.

ABUELITA
I asked if you would like more
tamales.

MIGUEL
S-sí?

ABUELITA
That's what I THOUGHT you said.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Abuelita runs our house just like
Mamá Imelda did.

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INT. OFRENDA ROOM - DAY

Abuelita adjusts the photo of her beloved Mamá Imelda. Then
she perks her ear at a hooting sound.


INT. KITCHEN - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel idly blows into a glass soda bottle. Abuelita takes
the bottle away.

ABUELITA
No music!


INT. MAMÁ COCO'S ROOM - DAY

Miguel listens as a truck drives by the window, blaring radio
tunes. Abuelita angrily slams the window shut.

ABUELITA
No music!!


EXT. STREET - EVENING

A trio of gentlemen serenade each other as they stroll by the
family compound.

MUSICIANS
(singing)
AUNQUE LA VIDA--




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Abuelita bursts out of the gate and chases them away.

ABUELITA
NO MUSIC!!!

Terrified, the musicians stumble as they run away.

MIGUEL (V.O)
I think we're the only family in
México who hates music...
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In a warm family dining area, Miguel playfully interacts with Mamá Coco while Abuelita insists he eat more tamales, showcasing her authoritative parenting. Despite Miguel's protests, Abuelita continues to fill his plate and enforces the family's strict no-music rule, even chasing away musicians outside. The scene highlights the conflict between Miguel's playful spirit and Abuelita's rigid rules, blending light-hearted moments with a sense of familial love.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Effective world-building
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant character development
  • Relatively low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes the family relationships and sets the tone for the story. It introduces key characters and themes while maintaining a playful and nostalgic atmosphere.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family, tradition, and the conflict surrounding music is effectively introduced and developed in the scene.

Plot: 7

The plot is advanced through the establishment of the family relationships and the conflict surrounding music, setting up the central conflict of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family traditions and individual passion, with a unique setting and cultural elements. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and relatable.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-defined and their relationships are effectively established, setting up potential character arcs and conflicts.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the groundwork is laid for potential growth and development.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to express himself and his love for music, despite the family's strict rules against it. This reflects his deeper desire for self-expression and connection to his passion.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to navigate the family dynamics and find a way to pursue his musical aspirations without going against his family's wishes.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict surrounding music is introduced and sets up potential conflicts within the family, adding tension to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Abuelita's strict rules and the family's aversion to music posing a significant challenge for Miguel. The audience is left unsure of how Miguel will overcome this obstacle.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, but the conflict surrounding music hints at potential higher stakes to come.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by establishing key relationships, themes, and conflicts.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected clash between the family's aversion to music and Miguel's passion for it. The audience is left wondering how Miguel will navigate this conflict.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict is evident in the clash between tradition and individual passion. The family values tradition and discipline, while Miguel values self-expression and music.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, particularly in the nostalgic connection to Mamá Imelda and the family traditions.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is engaging and reveals the characters' personalities and relationships, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its relatable family dynamics, humor, and the conflict between tradition and individual passion. The characters are well-developed and the dialogue is engaging.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions. It maintains the audience's interest and sets up the conflict effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions. The dialogue is formatted correctly, enhancing readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined settings and character interactions. It maintains a good pacing and rhythm, contributing to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes the family dynamics and the strict no-music rule enforced by Abuelita, which is crucial for setting up the central conflict of the story. However, the transition between the playful moments with Miguel and Mamá Coco to the more serious tone with Abuelita could be smoother. The abrupt shift might confuse the audience about the emotional stakes.
  • Miguel's playful interaction with Mamá Coco is charming and showcases their bond, but it could benefit from more depth. While the humor is present, adding a moment of genuine connection or a shared memory could enhance the emotional weight of their relationship, making the audience care more about their dynamic.
  • The dialogue is lively and captures the characters' personalities well, particularly Abuelita's authoritative nature. However, the use of voiceover can sometimes feel redundant. For instance, Miguel's voiceover about Abuelita being Mamá Coco's daughter could be shown through their interactions instead, allowing the audience to infer the relationship without explicit narration.
  • The visual elements, such as the tamales and the soda bottle, are effective in creating a vivid scene. However, the scene could be enriched by incorporating more sensory details, such as the aroma of the food or the sounds of the bustling household, to immerse the audience further into the setting.
  • The scene ends with a strong visual of Abuelita chasing away the musicians, which effectively highlights the family's aversion to music. However, it might be more impactful if this action were tied back to Miguel's internal conflict, perhaps by showing his reaction to the musicians being chased away, reinforcing his desire for music in contrast to his family's beliefs.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel shares a fond memory related to music with Mamá Coco, which could deepen their bond and foreshadow his internal struggle with the family's music ban.
  • Revise the voiceover to minimize redundancy. Instead of stating that Abuelita is Mamá Coco's daughter, show this relationship through their interactions, allowing the audience to deduce the connection.
  • Enhance the sensory details in the scene by describing the smells of the food, the sounds of the household, and the atmosphere, which will help create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • Smooth the transition between the playful moments and the more serious tone by incorporating a brief moment of reflection from Miguel, perhaps showing his internal conflict about the family's strict rules.
  • Include a reaction shot of Miguel when Abuelita chases away the musicians to emphasize his feelings about music and the family's aversion to it, reinforcing the central conflict of the story.



Scene 4 -  Miguel's Musical Aspirations
INT. RIVERA WORKSHOP - DAY

We see the Rivera family tinkering in the shoe shop, no music
to be heard. Miguel jogs past them.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
And my family’s fine with that...

He grabs his shine box, and heads out of the shoe shop.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
But me?

MAMÁ
Be back by lunch, mijo!

MIGUEL
Love you, Mamá!

Once outside, Miguel makes his way through the small town of


SANTA CECILIA - MORNING

MIGUEL (V.O.)
I am NOT like the rest of my
family...

He passes a woman sweeping a stoop.

WOMAN
Hola, Miguel!

MIGUEL
Hola!

He passes a band of musicians playing a tune. Miguel joins
with some air guitar and the further down the street he goes,
the more instruments and sounds layer in. The bells of the
church chime in harmony, a radio blares a cumbia rhythm.




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Running past a food stand, Miguel grabs a roll of pan dulce
and tosses the vendor a coin.

MIGUEL
Muchas gracias!

STREET VENDOR
De nada, Miguel!

As Miguel passes all these scenes, the music synthesizes and
he can't help but tap out rhythms along a table of alebrijes.
The fantastical wooden animal sculptures each play a
different tone like a marimba. Miguel finishes with a SMACK
on a trash can, out of which a pops up a scrappy hairless
Xolo dog. The dog, DANTE, barks and jumps up to lick Miguel,
who laughs.

MIGUEL
Hey, hey! Dante!

Miguel holds the pan dulce over Dante’s head.

MIGUEL
Sit. Down. Roll over. Shake.
Fist bump.

Dante obeys to the best of his ability.

MIGUEL
Good boy, Dante!

Miguel tosses the pan dulce to his furless friend who topples
back into the trash can.

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MARIACHI PLAZA - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel rounds the corner toward the town square. Vendors
sell sugar skulls and marigolds, and musicians fill the
square with music.

MIGUEL (V.O)
I know I'm not supposed to love
music -- but it's not my fault!
(beat)
It's his: Ernesto de la Cruz...

Miguel approaches a statue of a handsome mariachi at the
heart of the plaza.




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MIGUEL (V.O)
...The greatest musician of all
time.

A tour group and their TOUR GUIDE are gathered around the
base of the statue.

TOUR GUIDE
And right here, in this very plaza,
the young Ernesto de la Cruz took
his first steps toward becoming the
most beloved singer in Mexican
history!

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CLIPS of de la Cruz in his hay day: playing as a young man in
the plaza, serenading bystanders in a train car...

MIGUEL (V.O.)
He started out a total nobody from
Santa Cecilia, like me. But when
he played music, he made people
fall in love with him.

MORE CLIPS from de la Cruz’s films. He leaps from a tree
branch onto a galloping horse. He plays his signature skull
guitar with flourish and flair.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
He starred in movies. He had the
coolest guitar... He could fly!

A CLIP features de la Cruz dressed as a hovering priest, held
up by strings, in front of a cycling sky flat.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
And he wrote the best songs! But
my all-time favorite? It's--

A CLIP of de la Cruz performing in a fancy nightclub.

DE LA CRUZ
(singing)
REMEMBER ME
THOUGH I HAVE TO SAY GOODBYE
REMEMBER ME
DON'T LET IT MAKE YOU CRY
FOR EVEN IF I'M FAR AWAY
I HOLD YOU IN MY HEART
I SING A SECRET SONG TO YOU
EACH NIGHT WE ARE APART
REMEMBER ME
(MORE)

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DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
THOUGH I HAVE TO TRAVEL FAR
REMEMBER ME
EACH TIME YOU HEAR A SAD GUITAR
KNOW THAT I'M WITH YOU THE ONLY WAY
THAT I CAN BE...

MIGUEL (V.O.)
He lived the kind of life you dream
about... Until 1942...

As the audience swoons over de la Cruz, an absent-minded
stagehand leans on a lever. Ropes and pulleys go flying.

DE LA CRUZ
UNTIL YOU'RE IN MY ARMS AGAIN
REMEMBER ME!

De la Cruz is subsequently crushed by a giant bell.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
When he was crushed by a giant
bell.

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MARIACHI PLAZA - DAY

Miguel gazes up at the statue of de la Cruz in awe.

MIGUEL (V.O)
I wanna be just like him.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In this scene, Miguel jogs through his family's shoe shop, expressing his desire to pursue music despite his family's disapproval. He interacts playfully with townspeople and his dog, Dante, showcasing his love for music. After grabbing a sweet roll, he admires a statue of the famous musician Ernesto de la Cruz in the town square, reflecting on de la Cruz's life and tragic end. Miguel's admiration for de la Cruz highlights his aspiration to follow in the musician's footsteps, setting up a conflict between his passion and family expectations.
Strengths
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Effective use of music and visuals
  • Compelling introduction of key themes and conflicts
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more nuanced
  • Potential for more character development in future scenes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes the main character's personality, introduces key themes, and sets up conflicts that will drive the story forward. The mix of nostalgia, humor, and musical elements creates an engaging and emotionally resonant atmosphere.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a young boy with a passion for music in a family that forbids it is compelling and sets up interesting conflicts and character development. The scene effectively introduces key themes and establishes the tone of the story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene focuses on introducing the main character, setting up conflicts, and establishing key themes. It effectively moves the story forward and sets up expectations for future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the coming-of-age theme by incorporating elements of Mexican culture, music, and family dynamics. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene are well-defined and engaging, with clear motivations and relationships. The main character's playful nature and passion for music are effectively conveyed, as are the family dynamics and conflicts.

Character Changes: 7

The main character undergoes a subtle change in this scene, as he begins to question his family's prohibition of music and expresses his desire to follow in the footsteps of a legendary musician. This sets up potential character growth and development in future scenes.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music despite his family's disapproval. This reflects his deeper desire for self-expression and fulfillment.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to emulate his idol, Ernesto de la Cruz, and become a successful musician like him. This reflects the immediate challenge of pursuing his dream in a society that forbids music.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between the main character's passion for music and his family's prohibition of it is effectively established, setting up internal and external conflicts that will drive the story forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Miguel facing internal and external obstacles that challenge his pursuit of music.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes in the scene are relatively high for the main character, as he grapples with the conflict between his passion for music and his family's prohibition of it. This sets up potential risks and consequences for his actions.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key characters, conflicts, and themes, setting up expectations for future developments and character arcs.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is somewhat predictable in terms of Miguel's aspirations and the obstacles he faces, but the introduction of Dante and the musical elements add a layer of unpredictability.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the clash between Miguel's personal aspirations and his family's traditions. This challenges his beliefs about following his passion and staying true to his roots.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, blending nostalgia, humor, and a sense of longing for the main character's dreams. The interactions between characters and the use of music enhance the emotional resonance of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene is engaging and helps to establish character personalities and relationships. The use of voiceover adds depth to the storytelling and enhances the emotional impact of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its dynamic setting, lively character interactions, and the protagonist's compelling internal and external goals.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotion, leading to a climactic moment with de la Cruz's tragic fate.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, character actions, and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a well-paced structure that effectively introduces the protagonist's goals, sets up conflicts, and builds towards a climactic moment.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes Miguel's internal conflict between his love for music and his family's aversion to it. The use of voiceover allows for a deeper insight into Miguel's thoughts, which is a strong narrative choice. However, the transition from the workshop to the town square could be smoother to maintain the flow of the scene.
  • The interactions with the townspeople, such as the woman sweeping and the street vendor, add a layer of realism and community to the setting. However, these moments could be enhanced by including more specific details about the characters or their interactions with Miguel to make them feel more memorable.
  • The visual elements, such as the vibrant town of Santa Cecilia and the layering of sounds, are well-described and create an engaging atmosphere. However, the scene could benefit from more sensory details, such as the smells of food or the warmth of the sun, to immerse the audience further into Miguel's world.
  • The introduction of Dante, Miguel's dog, adds a playful element to the scene, but the dialogue could be tightened to make the interactions feel more natural. For example, instead of listing commands for Dante, a more dynamic exchange could showcase their bond.
  • The voiceover narration is effective in conveying Miguel's aspirations, but it could be more concise in certain areas. Some lines feel repetitive, particularly when expressing his desire to be different from his family. Streamlining these thoughts could enhance the emotional impact.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of hesitation or conflict in Miguel's interactions with the townspeople to highlight his internal struggle with his family's disapproval of music.
  • Incorporate more specific sensory details to enrich the setting, such as the sounds of the town, the aroma of food from the vendors, or the feel of the marigold petals, to create a more immersive experience.
  • Revise the dialogue with Dante to make it feel more spontaneous and playful, perhaps by including a humorous mishap or a moment of miscommunication that showcases their relationship.
  • Tighten the voiceover narration by eliminating repetitive phrases and focusing on the most impactful lines that convey Miguel's passion for music and his desire to break free from family expectations.
  • Enhance the transition between the workshop and the town square by using a visual or auditory cue that connects the two locations, such as Miguel hearing music from the plaza as he leaves the workshop.



Scene 5 -  A Struggle for Melody
EXT. CEMETERY - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel weaves up to de la Cruz's mausoleum and peeks in the
window. He catches a glimpse of de la Cruz's signature skull
guitar.

MIGUEL (V.O.)
Sometimes, I look at de la Cruz and
I get this feeling... like we're
connected somehow. Like, if HE
could play music, maybe someday I
could too...




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MIGUEL (CONT’D)
...If it wasn't for my family.

PLAZA MARIACHI
(playful)
Ay, ay, ay, muchacho.

MIGUEL
Huh?

PLAZA MARIACHI
I asked for a shoe shine, not your
life story.

Miguel comes out of his reverie and looks up at the PLAZA
MARIACHI whose shoes he is shining.

MIGUEL
Oh, yeah, sorry.

He goes back to scrubbing the man's shoe. As Miguel shines,
the mariachi plucks his guitar idly.

MIGUEL
I just can't really talk about any
of this at home so...

PLAZA MARIACHI
Look, if I were you I'd march right
up to my family and say, "Hey! I'm
a musician. Deal with it!"

MIGUEL
I could never say that...

PLAZA MARIACHI
You ARE a musician, no?

MIGUEL
I don't know. I mean... I only
really play for myself--

PLAZA MARIACHI
Did de la Cruz become the world's
best musician by hiding his sweet,
sweet skills? No! He walked out
onto that plaza and he played out
loud!




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The mariachi gets an idea. He points to the gazebo where
organizers are setting up for a show. They unfurl a canvas
poster which reads "TALENT SHOW."

PLAZA MARIACHI (CONT'D)
Ah, mira, mira! They're setting up
for tonight. The music competition
for Día de Muertos. You wanna be
like your hero? You should sign
up!

MIGUEL
Uh-uh, my family would freak!

PLAZA MARIACHI
Look, if you're too scared, then,
well... have fun making shoes.

Miguel considers this.

PLAZA MARIACHI (CONT'D)
C'mon. What did de la Cruz always
say?

MIGUEL
...Seize your moment?

The mariachi appraises Miguel, then offers his guitar.

PLAZA MARIACHI
Show me what you got, muchacho.
I'll be your first audience.

Miguel's brows rise, surprised. He reaches to take the
instrument, regarding it as if holding a holy relic.

Miguel spreads his fingers across the strings anticipating
his chord and...

ABUELITA (O.S.)
MIGUEL!

Startled, Miguel impulsively throws the guitar back onto the
mariachi's lap. He turns to see Abuelita marching toward
him. Miguel's TÍO BERTO (40s) and PRIMA ROSA (16), follow
with supplies from the market.

MIGUEL
Abuelita!

ABUELITA
What are you doing here?




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MIGUEL
Um...uh...

Miguel quickly packs away his shine rag and polishes.
Abuelita barrels up to the mariachi.

She hits his hat with her shoe and waves him away.

ABUELITA
You leave my grandson alone!

PLAZA MARIACHI
Doña, please -- I was just getting
a shine!

ABUELITA
I know your tricks, mariachi!
(to Miguel)
What did he say to you?

MIGUEL
He was just showing me his
guitar...

Gasps from the family.

TÍO BERTO
Shame on you!

Abuelita lords over the mariachi, shoe aimed directly between
his eyes.

ABUELITA
My grandson is a sweet little
angelito querido cielito -- he
wants no part of your music,
mariachi! You keep away from him!

The mariachi scrambles away, snatching his hat off the
ground before he goes. Abuelita hugs Miguel protectively to
her bosom.

ABUELITA
Ay, pobrecito! Estás bien, mijo?

She peppers him with kisses then releases him from the
embrace. He gasps for air.

ABUELITA
(distressed)
You know better than to be here in
this place! You will come home.
Now.



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Abuelita turns toward home. Miguel sighs and gathers his
shine box. Then, seeing a flyer for the plaza “TALENT SHOW”,
he can't help but pocket it. He follows Abuelita.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary Miguel visits de la Cruz's mausoleum, feeling inspired to pursue music despite his family's disapproval. At Mariachi Plaza, a mariachi encourages him to sign up for a talent show, igniting his passion. However, Abuelita arrives, scolding the mariachi and insisting Miguel come home, reinforcing the family's stance against music. As he leaves, Miguel secretly pockets a flyer for the talent show, torn between his dreams and family expectations.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Compelling theme of following one's dreams
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Slightly predictable conflict setup
  • Some cliched character interactions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes Miguel's desire to pursue music, the family's opposition to it, and sets up the conflict that will drive the plot forward. The dialogue and interactions are engaging, and the emotional stakes are high.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a young boy torn between his love for music and his family's ban on it is compelling and sets up a strong foundation for the story. The idea of seizing one's moment is central to the scene.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses as Miguel's internal conflict is established, and the central conflict between his passion for music and his family's opposition is introduced. The scene sets up important story elements.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of pursuing one's passion against family expectations, with a unique cultural backdrop and authentic character interactions.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined, with Miguel's rebellious nature and Abuelita's protective attitude coming through strongly. The interactions between characters drive the scene forward.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel's character undergoes a subtle change as he grapples with his passion for music and his family's disapproval. The scene sets up potential character growth in future developments.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music despite his family's disapproval. This reflects his deeper desire for self-expression and fulfillment.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to participate in the talent show and showcase his musical talent. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in defying his family's expectations.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's ban on it creates tension and drives the scene forward. The clash of values adds depth to the character relationships.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing resistance from his family and societal expectations, creating conflict and raising the stakes.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high as Miguel faces the dilemma of pursuing his passion for music against his family's strict no-music rule. The scene sets up the potential consequences of his choices.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing Miguel's internal conflict and the central conflict of the story. It sets up important plot points and character dynamics.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected conflict between Miguel and his family, adding tension and uncertainty to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Miguel's desire for self-expression and his family's traditional values. This challenges his beliefs about following his dreams and staying true to himself.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes emotions through Miguel's internal struggle and the family dynamics. The protective nature of Abuelita and Miguel's rebellious spirit create a strong emotional impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the characters' emotions and motivations, especially Miguel's internal struggle and Abuelita's strictness. The dialogue adds depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic character interactions, emotional stakes, and the relatable theme of pursuing one's dreams.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional depth, leading to a climactic moment that propels the narrative forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, following the expected format for its genre.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution that advances the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's internal conflict between his passion for music and his family's disapproval, which is a central theme of the story. The dialogue between Miguel and the Plaza Mariachi is engaging and highlights Miguel's struggle, making it relatable for the audience.
  • The use of Miguel's voiceover at the beginning establishes a strong emotional connection to de la Cruz, setting up the stakes for Miguel's aspirations. However, the transition from the mausoleum to the plaza could be smoother to maintain the emotional momentum.
  • The Plaza Mariachi serves as a catalyst for Miguel's dreams, but his character could be fleshed out further. Adding a brief backstory or motivation for why he encourages Miguel could deepen the audience's investment in both characters.
  • Abuelita's sudden entrance creates a strong moment of tension, but the pacing feels rushed. The scene could benefit from a moment of hesitation or internal struggle for Miguel before he is interrupted, emphasizing the weight of his decision to pursue music.
  • The comedic elements, such as Abuelita hitting the mariachi's hat with her shoe, provide levity but could risk undermining the emotional stakes. Balancing humor with the seriousness of Miguel's situation is crucial to maintain the scene's overall tone.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Miguel reflects on his feelings before the Plaza Mariachi speaks, allowing the audience to feel his internal conflict more deeply.
  • Enhance the Plaza Mariachi's character by giving him a line or two that reveals his own connection to music or a personal story that resonates with Miguel's situation.
  • To improve pacing, allow for a moment of silence or contemplation after the mariachi suggests Miguel sign up for the talent show, giving Miguel time to weigh his options before Abuelita arrives.
  • Ensure that the humor introduced by Abuelita does not overshadow the emotional stakes. Perhaps have her express concern in a more serious tone before the comedic action, maintaining the gravity of the moment.
  • Consider using visual storytelling to show Miguel's longing for music, such as a close-up of his expression as he watches the mariachi play, which could enhance the emotional impact of the scene.



Scene 6 -  Family Concerns and Comedic Chaos
EXT. STREET - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel catches up to his family.

TÍO BERTO
How many times have we told you --
that plaza is crawling with
mariachis!

MIGUEL
Yes, Tío Berto.

Dante ambles up to Miguel, sniffing and whining for a treat.

MIGUEL
No, no, no!

Abuelita shoos him away.

ABUELITA
Go away, you! Go!

Dante darts off, scared.

MIGUEL
It's just Dante...

Abuelita throws her shoe at the dog.

ABUELITA
Never name a street dog. They'll
follow you forever.
(beat)
Now, go get my shoe.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In a lively street scene, Miguel reunites with his family after a brief separation. Tío Berto warns him about the dangers of the plaza filled with mariachis, while Miguel's dog, Dante, seeks treats but is shooed away by Abuelita, who humorously insists that street dogs shouldn't be named. The scene blends familial concern with playful interactions, culminating in Abuelita commanding Miguel to retrieve her shoe, restoring a sense of normalcy.
Strengths
  • Effective establishment of family dynamics
  • Clear setup of central conflict
  • Engaging character interactions
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Emotional impact could be heightened in certain moments

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's disapproval, while also establishing the playful and nostalgic tone of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family traditions, musical aspirations, and generational conflicts is well-developed and engaging.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses by introducing Miguel's desire to pursue music despite his family's disapproval, setting up future conflicts and character development.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on family dynamics and cultural traditions, offering a unique take on the conflict between tradition and individuality. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined, with clear motivations and relationships that drive the story forward.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel's character undergoes a subtle change as he begins to assert his musical aspirations despite his family's disapproval.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to navigate the expectations and rules set by his family while also asserting his own independence and identity. This reflects his deeper need for autonomy and self-expression.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to retrieve Abuelita's shoe, which serves as a minor task reflecting his compliance with family demands and traditions.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's disapproval is established, setting up future tension and drama.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with minor conflicts and obstacles that add tension and humor. The audience is left unsure of how Miguel will navigate the situation with Dante.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are set as Miguel faces the dilemma of pursuing his passion for music against his family's wishes.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing key conflicts, character motivations, and setting up future plot developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions of the characters, such as Abuelita throwing her shoe at the dog. The outcome of the interaction with Dante adds a layer of uncertainty.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the clash between tradition and individuality. Abuelita's advice about naming street dogs symbolizes the importance of tradition and superstition, while Miguel's interaction with Dante represents his desire for personal connection and freedom of choice.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of nostalgia and playfulness, as well as setting up emotional stakes for Miguel's character.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the relationships between characters and sets up the central conflict of the scene.

Engagement: 8

This scene is engaging because of the lively interactions between characters, the humor infused in the dialogue, and the relatable family dynamics. The presence of a street dog adds an element of unpredictability.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and humor through the interactions between characters. The rhythm of dialogue and actions enhances the scene's impact.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is well-executed, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. It follows the expected format for a screenplay.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character interactions and progression of events. It adheres to the expected format for a family drama genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the familial dynamic and Miguel's struggle between his desires and his family's expectations. Tío Berto's admonishment and Abuelita's authoritative presence reinforce the family's strict views on music, which is a central theme in the story.
  • The dialogue is concise and serves to establish character relationships and conflicts. However, it could benefit from more emotional depth. For instance, Miguel's responses could reflect his internal conflict more vividly, perhaps through a hint of frustration or longing in his tone.
  • The visual elements, such as Abuelita throwing her shoe, add a comedic touch, but the action could be enhanced to show more of Miguel's reaction to this behavior. This would help to illustrate the tension between his love for music and the family's aversion to it.
  • The scene transitions smoothly from the previous one, but it could be strengthened by incorporating Miguel's thoughts or feelings about the talent show flyer he pocketed. This would create a stronger connection to his aspirations and the conflict he faces.
  • Dante's presence adds a lighthearted element, but the interaction could be expanded to show Miguel's affection for his dog, contrasting with Abuelita's sternness. This would further emphasize Miguel's youthful innocence and desire for freedom.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two of internal monologue for Miguel to express his feelings about being scolded and his secret aspirations. This could provide insight into his character and deepen the audience's connection to him.
  • Enhance the comedic aspect of Abuelita's shoe-throwing by including a playful reaction from Miguel, such as a witty comeback or a resigned acceptance of her behavior, which would add layers to their relationship.
  • Introduce a moment where Miguel hesitates before responding to Tío Berto, showcasing his internal struggle. This could be a brief pause or a facial expression that conveys his frustration or desire to assert his individuality.
  • Explore the dynamic between Miguel and Dante further. Perhaps include a moment where Miguel affectionately pets Dante before Abuelita shoos him away, reinforcing Miguel's nurturing side and his bond with his dog.
  • Consider ending the scene with a visual cue that hints at Miguel's determination to pursue music, such as a close-up of the talent show flyer in his pocket, which could serve as a symbolic representation of his dreams.



Scene 7 -  Family Tensions and Dreams
INT. RIVERA WORKSHOP

The Rivera workshop is abuzz with family making shoes.
WHOMP! Miguel is plopped onto a stool, ready for a lecture.

ABUELITA
I found your son in Mariachi Plaza!

PAPÁ
(disappointed)
Miguel...



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MAMÁ
You know how Abuelita feels about
the plaza.

MIGUEL
I was just shining shoes!

TÍO BERTO
A musician's shoes!

Gasps from the family. PRIMO ABEL (19) is so shocked he
loses his grip on the shoe he is polishing, which zips away
from the polisher and lodges itself in the roof.

MIGUEL
But the plaza's where all the foot
traffic is.

PAPÁ
If Abuelita says no more plaza,
then no more plaza.

MIGUEL
(blurting)
But what about tonight?

PAPÁ FRANCO
What's tonight?

MIGUEL
Well they're having this talent
show-

Abuelita perks her ear, suspicious. Miguel squirms, deciding
whether to go on.

MIGUEL
And I thought I might...

Mamá looks at Miguel, curious.

MAMÁ
...Sign up?

MIGUEL
Well, maybe?

PRIMA ROSA
(laughing)
You have to have talent to be in a
talent show.




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PRIMO ABEL
What are YOU going to do, shine
shoes?

The shoe from the ceiling falls back down on Abel's head.

ABUELITA
It's Día de los Muertos -- no one's
going anywhere. Tonight is about
family.

She deposits a pile of marigolds in Miguel's arms.

ABUELITA
Ofrenda room. Vámonos.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In the Rivera workshop during Día de los Muertos, Miguel faces Abuelita's disapproval after being found in Mariachi Plaza. While Papá expresses disappointment and Mamá shows curiosity about a talent show Miguel wants to join, Tío Berto humorously reveals that Miguel was shining musician's shoes, shocking the family. Abuelita emphasizes the importance of family traditions, handing Miguel marigolds and directing him to the ofrenda room, leaving Miguel's aspirations unresolved amidst familial tension and humor.
Strengths
  • Effective establishment of central conflict
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Intriguing setup for future plot developments
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Character motivations could be further explored

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes the central conflict and themes, introduces key characters, and sets up the plot for future developments. The mix of playful moments and serious family dynamics adds depth to the storytelling.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of family conflict and musical aspirations is central to the scene, setting up the overarching themes of the story. The introduction of the talent show adds a layer of intrigue and sets up future plot developments.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses effectively in this scene, introducing key conflicts and motivations for the characters. The revelation of the talent show creates anticipation for future events and character growth.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the conflict between tradition and individuality within a family setting. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined in this scene, with distinct personalities and motivations. Miguel's rebellious nature and his family's strict adherence to tradition are effectively portrayed, setting up potential character arcs.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel's revelation about the talent show and his desire to pursue music foreshadow potential character growth and development. The scene sets up a journey for Miguel to challenge his family's expectations and follow his dreams.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music and perform in the talent show, despite his family's disapproval. This reflects his deeper desire for self-expression and following his dreams.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to convince his family to let him participate in the talent show. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in balancing family expectations with his own aspirations.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's strict no-music rule creates tension and sets up potential obstacles for the character. The conflicting motivations add depth to the storytelling.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and uncertainty, adding depth to the characters' interactions.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as Miguel confronts his family's strict no-music rule and reveals his desire to pursue music. The potential consequences of defying tradition add tension and anticipation for future events.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, motivations, and plot points that will drive future developments. The revelation of the talent show sets up anticipation for Miguel's journey and potential obstacles.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected reactions from the family members and the shifting dynamics between the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict is between tradition and individuality. Miguel's desire to pursue music clashes with his family's traditional values, particularly on Día de los Muertos.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a range of emotions, from playfulness to tension, effectively engaging the audience in the characters' struggles and aspirations. The emotional impact sets up future developments and character growth.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the tensions and emotions between the characters, especially Miguel and his family members. The interactions feel authentic and contribute to character development.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the lively family dynamics, humorous moments, and the conflict between tradition and individuality.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the characters' dilemmas.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear dialogue attribution and scene descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a family drama genre, with clear character dynamics and progression of conflict.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the familial tension surrounding Miguel's passion for music, contrasting it with the family's strict adherence to tradition. The dialogue is lively and reflects the characters' personalities well, particularly Abuelita's authoritative nature and Miguel's youthful defiance.
  • The use of physical comedy, such as the shoe getting lodged in the roof, adds a humorous touch that lightens the mood amidst the conflict. This visual gag also serves to emphasize the family's focus on shoemaking, reinforcing the theme of tradition versus personal aspiration.
  • However, the scene could benefit from deeper emotional stakes. While the dialogue conveys the family's disapproval of music, it lacks a moment that highlights Miguel's internal struggle or passion for music beyond just wanting to participate in the talent show. A brief flashback or a line reflecting on his dreams could enhance the emotional weight.
  • The pacing feels slightly rushed, particularly when Miguel mentions the talent show. The transition from the family’s disapproval to Miguel's excitement about the show could be more gradual, allowing for a moment of tension before the comedic relief of the shoe falling.
  • The scene ends abruptly with Abuelita's command to go to the ofrenda room. While this reinforces her authority, it might be more impactful to include a moment of reflection from Miguel, showcasing his disappointment or determination before the cut.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two where Miguel expresses his love for music more explicitly, perhaps by recalling a moment when music made him feel alive or connected to his family, even if they don't realize it.
  • Slow down the pacing slightly when Miguel mentions the talent show. Allow the family to react more fully to his suggestion, creating a moment of tension before the humor of the shoe gag.
  • Incorporate a brief visual or dialogue that hints at Miguel's dreams or aspirations, perhaps through a memory or a line about how music makes him feel, to deepen the emotional stakes.
  • Instead of ending with Abuelita's command, consider a closing line from Miguel that reflects his internal conflict, such as a quiet determination to pursue music despite the family's disapproval, which could set up the next scene more effectively.



Scene 8 -  The Weight of Tradition
INT. OFRENDA ROOM - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel follows his Abuelita to the family ofrenda, holding
the pile of flowers as she arranges them on the altar.

ABUELITA
Don't give me that look. Día de
los Muertos is the one night of the
year our ancestors can come visit
us.
(beat)
We've put their photos on the
ofrenda so their spirits can cross
over. That is very important! If
we don't put them up, they can't
come!
(beat)
We made all this food -- set out
the things they loved in life,
mijo. All this work to bring the
family together. I don't want you
sneaking off to who-knows-where.

She looks up to find Miguel sneaking away.

ABUELITA (CONT’D)
Where are you going?

MIGUEL
I thought we were done...




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ABUELITA
Ay, Dios mío... Being part of this
family means being HERE for this
family... I don't want to see you
end up like--

Abuelita looks up to the photo of the faceless musician.

MIGUEL
Like Mamá Coco's papá?

ABUELITA
Never mention that man! He's
better off forgotten.

MIGUEL
But you're the one who--

ABUELITA
Ta, ta, ta-tch!

MIGUEL
I was just--

ABUELITA
Tch-tch!

MIGUEL
But--

ABUELITA
Tch!

MIGUEL
I--

ABUELITA
Tch-tch!

MAMÁ COCO
Papá?

They look to find Mamá Coco agitated.

MAMÁ COCO (CONT'D)
Papá is home...?

ABUELITA
Mamá, cálmese, cálmese.

MAMÁ COCO
Papá is coming home?




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ABUELITA
No Mamá. It's okay, I'm here.

Mamá Coco looks up at Abuelita.

MAMÁ COCO
Who are you?

Sadness rises in Abuelita; she swallows it down.

ABUELITA
Rest, Mamá.

Abuelita returns to the ofrenda.

ABUELITA (CONT'D)
I'm hard on you because I care,
Miguel.
(beat)
Miguel... Miguel?

She looks around the room. Miguel is nowhere to be found.
Abuelita steps up to the ofrenda.

ABUELITA (CONT'D)
(sigh)
What are we going to do with that
boy...?

She looks to the photo of Mamá Imelda. Abuelita's eyes
brighten with an idea.

ABUELITA (CONT'D)
You're right. That's just what he
needs!

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Genres: ["Family","Animation","Drama"]

Summary In the ofrenda room, Miguel follows his Abuelita as she explains the significance of the Día de los Muertos altar and expresses her wish for him to embrace family traditions. While arranging flowers, she warns him against sneaking away, referencing a family member best forgotten. The scene deepens when Mamá Coco, confused, inquires about her father, prompting Abuelita to comfort her. Despite her efforts, Miguel's rebellious spirit leads him to sneak away, leaving Abuelita worried and reflecting on how to manage his defiance.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character relationships
  • Theme exploration
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development
  • Predictable conflicts

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys the emotional depth of the characters and sets up important conflicts and themes for the story. The dialogue is engaging, and the pacing keeps the audience invested in the unfolding family dynamics.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring family traditions, memory, and the conflict between individual desires and familial expectations is well-developed in the scene. It sets up important themes and character arcs that will drive the story forward.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in the scene focuses on character relationships and conflicts, setting up important dynamics that will drive the story forward. The scene moves the narrative forward by establishing key motivations and tensions.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on family dynamics and cultural traditions, blending humor and emotional depth to explore themes of identity and legacy. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and relatable, adding to the scene's originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-defined and their relationships are effectively portrayed, adding depth to the scene. Each character's personality and motivations are clear, setting up potential arcs for development.

Character Changes: 7

While there are subtle shifts in character dynamics, particularly in Miguel's defiance and Abuelita's protective nature, the scene primarily sets up potential changes and growth for the characters in future developments.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to explore his passion for music and connect with his deceased ancestors, particularly his musician great-great-grandfather. This reflects his deeper desire for self-expression and understanding his family's history.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to avoid his family's disapproval and restrictions on his music aspirations. He wants to pursue his passion without sacrificing his family ties.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between individual desires and familial expectations is a central tension in the scene, driving character motivations and setting up potential resolutions. The conflict adds depth to the relationships between the characters.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Abuelita's disapproval and Miguel's desire for creative freedom creating a compelling conflict that drives the narrative forward.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderately high in terms of the conflict between individual desires and familial expectations, as well as the potential consequences of defying family traditions. The scene sets up important choices and consequences for the characters.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing key conflicts, motivations, and themes that will drive the narrative. It sets up important plot points and character arcs that will unfold in subsequent scenes.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the shifting dynamics between characters, unexpected revelations, and emotional twists that keep the audience invested in the story.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around tradition versus individuality. Abuelita represents the importance of family unity and honoring ancestors, while Miguel seeks personal fulfillment and creative expression through music, challenging the traditional values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, particularly in the interactions between Abuelita and Miguel, as well as the poignant moment with Mamá Coco. The sentimentality and affection between the characters resonate with the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the emotions and conflicts between the characters, adding depth to their interactions. The dialogue also sets up important themes and motivations for the story.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, humor, and cultural richness, drawing the audience into the characters' conflicts and motivations.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional resonance, allowing for moments of reflection and character development to unfold naturally.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions, character dialogue, and transitions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a coherent structure that effectively conveys the characters' motivations and conflicts, building tension and emotional resonance.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the tension between Miguel's desire for independence and Abuelita's strict adherence to family traditions. This conflict is central to the narrative and is well-expressed through their dialogue.
  • Abuelita's character is portrayed as both authoritative and caring, which adds depth to her motivations. However, the scene could benefit from more emotional nuance in her interactions with Miguel, particularly in how her past experiences shape her current behavior.
  • The introduction of Mamá Coco adds an emotional layer to the scene, highlighting the impact of memory and loss within the family. However, her sudden agitation feels slightly abrupt. A smoother transition into her concern about her father could enhance the emotional weight.
  • The repetitive 'Tch-tch!' from Abuelita serves as a comedic element but may come off as overly dismissive. This could detract from the gravity of the conversation about family and memory. Balancing humor with the seriousness of the topic is crucial.
  • The scene ends with Abuelita's realization about what Miguel needs, which is a strong setup for the next moment. However, it could be more impactful if the scene concluded with a clearer emotional or thematic statement that resonates with the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Abuelita reflects on her own experiences with loss and family, which could provide context for her strictness and deepen her character.
  • To enhance Mamá Coco's agitation, include a brief flashback or a line that connects her confusion to her memories of her father, making her emotional state more relatable.
  • Reduce the frequency of Abuelita's 'Tch-tch!' to maintain the scene's emotional gravity. Instead, use body language or a more varied vocal response to convey her frustration.
  • Incorporate a moment of silence or a shared look between Miguel and Abuelita after Mamá Coco's outburst to emphasize the weight of their family history and the unspoken bond they share.
  • End the scene with a more poignant line or action from Abuelita that encapsulates her love for Miguel while still expressing her fears, creating a stronger emotional hook for the audience.



Scene 9 -  A Dream Ignited
EXT. SIDE STREET

Tío Berto unloads rolls of leather from a truckbed. Nearby,
Dante sleeps under the shade of a tree. He startles awake by
a faint TWANGING. The dog scrambles up to the roof.

He reaches a shoe sign advertising the Rivera Family business
and lifts it up.


INT. ROOFTOP HIDEOUT

Dante pokes his head in. Miguel turns and gasps.




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MIGUEL
Oh, it's you. Get in here, c'mon,
Dante. Hurry up.

Dante wriggles into the hideout. Miguel is huddled over
something. The dog peeks around his shoulder.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
You're gonna get me in trouble,
boy. Someone could hear me!

Miguel reveals a makeshift guitar, cobbled together from a
beat up old soundboard and random other items.

He takes a china marker and sketches a nose on what appears
to be his own version of a skull guitar head.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
I wish someone wanted to hear me...

Miguel tunes the guitar.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Other than you...

Dante gives Miguel a big sloppy lick. Miguel gives a grossed-
out chuckle. He lifts his guitar and strums.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
Perfecto!

He crawls to the far side of the attic where he's built his
own ofrenda to Ernesto de la Cruz. Posters, candles, and
songbooks are arranged with care. Miguel lights the candles
with reverence, illuminating an album cover of de la Cruz
holding his skull guitar.

Miguel compares the head of his guitar to the album cover.
Then he imitates de la Cruz's pose and smile.

He switches on a beat up old TV and pushes a tape into the
VCR, "Best of de la Cruz" scrawled on the spine.

A montage of the greatest moments from de la Cruz's films
plays out.

A clip from "A QUIEN YO AMO:"

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
I have to sing. I have to play.
The music, it's -- it's not just in
me. It is me.




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Miguel strums his guitar as de la Cruz imparts his wisdom.
More clips run in the background as Miguel plays:

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
When life gets me down, I play my
guitar.

In a clip from "A QUIEN YO AMO:"

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
The rest of the world may follow
the rules, but I must follow my
heart!

De la Cruz kisses a woman passionately. Miguel cringes.

Another clip from "A QUIEN YO AMO:"

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
You know that feeling? Like
there's a song in the air and it's
playing just for you...

As Miguel watches de la Cruz play guitar in the video, he
repeats the melody on his own guitar.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
(singing)
A FEELING SO CLOSE
YOU COULD REACH OUT AND TOUCH IT
I NEVER KNEW I COULD
WANT SOMETHING SO MUCH
BUT IT'S TRUE...

As a good-natured priest in "NUESTRA IGLESIA:"

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
You must have faith, sister.

NUN (FILM CLIP)
Oh but Padre, he will never listen.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
He will listen... to MUSIC!
(singing)
ONLY A SONG
ONLY A SONG
HAS THE POWER TO CHANGE A HEART...

Miguel loses himself in the music.




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DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
Never underestimate the power of
music...

Miguel's tune intertwines with the melodies on the TV set.
The clip jumps forward:

LOLA (FILM CLIP)
But my father, he will never give
his permission.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
I am done asking permission. When
you see your moment you mustn't let
it pass you by, you must seize it!

The tape ends with an interview clip.

INTERVIEWER (FILM CLIP)
Señor de la Cruz, what did it take
for you to seize your moment?

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
I had to have faith in my dream.
No one was going to hand it to me.
It was up to me to reach for that
dream, grab it tight, and make it
come true.

MIGUEL
...and make it come true.

The tape ends. The words sink into Miguel. He reaches for
the flyer for the plaza “TALENT SHOW.”

MIGUEL
No more hiding, Dante. I gotta
seize my moment!

Dante wags his tail, panting happily.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
I'm gonna play in Mariachi Plaza if
it kills me!

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In this scene, Miguel, inspired by his idol Ernesto de la Cruz, works on a makeshift guitar in his rooftop hideout while his dog Dante provides support. As he lights candles on an ofrenda dedicated to de la Cruz and watches clips of the musician's films, Miguel expresses his longing for someone to hear him play. Motivated by de la Cruz's wisdom about music and following dreams, Miguel resolves to participate in a talent show at Mariachi Plaza, filled with determination to seize his moment.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Emotional depth
  • Visually captivating
  • Musically engaging
Weaknesses
  • Potential predictability in Miguel's decision to pursue music despite family disapproval

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene effectively establishes Miguel's character, his passion for music, and the internal and external conflicts he faces. It sets up the central theme of seizing opportunities and showcases the emotional depth of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of pursuing one's dreams against all odds is central to the scene. It effectively sets up Miguel's character arc and establishes key themes of family, tradition, and individuality.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses effectively, introducing conflicts and motivations that drive the narrative forward. Miguel's decision to participate in the talent show sets up future events and character development.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on the conflict between tradition and personal ambition, with authentic character interactions and a focus on music as a transformative force.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-defined, with Miguel's passion and determination shining through. Abuelita's strictness and the family dynamics add depth to the scene, creating compelling interactions.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes a significant change in this scene, from hiding his passion for music to openly declaring his intentions to pursue his dreams. This sets up his character arc and future growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to be heard and recognized for his musical talent, reflecting his desire for validation and acceptance.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to participate in the talent show at Mariachi Plaza, showcasing his musical skills and pursuing his dream of becoming a musician.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel's passion for music and his family's disapproval creates tension and drives the narrative forward. The internal conflict within Miguel adds depth to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from Miguel's family's expectations and traditions, creating conflict and obstacles for his musical aspirations.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high for Miguel, as he risks defying his family's wishes and pursuing his dreams of becoming a musician. The scene sets up potential consequences and challenges for the character.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing key conflicts, motivations, and character dynamics. Miguel's decision to participate in the talent show sets up future events and challenges.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in Miguel's decision to defy tradition and pursue his dream, adding tension and intrigue to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the tension between following tradition and pursuing personal dreams. Miguel's passion for music clashes with his family's expectations and traditions.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from nostalgia to hope to excitement. Miguel's journey and determination resonate with viewers, creating a strong emotional connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the characters' emotions and motivations. Miguel's inner monologue and interactions with Dante and the TV clips add layers to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, relatable themes, and compelling character development.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional resonance, leading to Miguel's pivotal decision to pursue his dream.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to industry standards and effectively conveys the visual and emotional elements of the story.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure that builds tension and emotional resonance, leading to Miguel's decision to pursue his dream.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's internal struggle and desire for self-expression through music, which is a central theme of the screenplay. The use of the makeshift guitar symbolizes his resourcefulness and determination, making it relatable for the audience.
  • The dialogue is engaging and reflects Miguel's youthful enthusiasm, particularly in his interactions with Dante. The playful banter between Miguel and his dog adds a light-hearted touch that balances the more serious themes of family expectations and personal dreams.
  • The montage of de la Cruz's film clips serves as a powerful narrative device, allowing the audience to understand Miguel's admiration for the musician while also reinforcing the idea that music is integral to his identity. However, the transition between the clips and Miguel's actions could be smoother to maintain the flow of the scene.
  • The emotional weight of the scene is heightened by Miguel's declaration of intent to 'seize his moment,' which serves as a pivotal turning point for his character. This line encapsulates his determination and sets the stage for the conflict that will arise from his pursuit of music against his family's wishes.
  • While the scene is strong overall, it could benefit from a clearer visual distinction between the clips and Miguel's reality. This would enhance the audience's understanding of his escapism and the contrast between his dreams and his family's expectations.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more sensory details to the scene, such as the sounds of the bustling street below or the smell of leather from the workshop, to create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • Enhance the emotional stakes by including a moment where Miguel reflects on the consequences of pursuing music, perhaps recalling a specific instance of family disapproval. This would deepen the conflict and make his decision to seize the moment more impactful.
  • To improve the pacing, consider interspersing Miguel's actions with brief reactions from Dante, emphasizing their bond and adding comedic relief. This could also serve to highlight Miguel's isolation in his passion for music.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating a brief flashback or memory that illustrates Miguel's connection to music from a younger age. This would provide context for his current desires and reinforce the theme of familial legacy.
  • Ensure that the transition from the montage back to Miguel's reality is seamless. You might consider using a visual cue, such as a close-up of Miguel's face reflecting his emotions, to bridge the gap between the clips and his determination to perform.



Scene 10 -  Día de los Muertos Begins
EXT. RIVERA COMPOUND - SUNSET

Children run by with sparklers as Abuelita opens the doors to
the family compound.




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ABUELITA
Día de los Muertos has begun!

In the courtyard, two TODDLER COUSINS haphazardly scatter
marigold petals from their baskets.

MAMÁ
No, no, no, no, no.

Mamá corrects them, creating a path from the ofrenda room to
the front gate.

MAMÁ (CONT'D)
We have to make a clear path. The
petals guide our ancestors home. We
don't want their spirits to get
lost. We want them to come, and
enjoy all the food and drinks on
the ofrenda, sí?

As Mamá teaches, Miguel and Dante sneak across the roof and
drop to the sidewalk outside the compound, Miguel clutching
his guitar.

Suddenly Tío Berto and Papá round the corner carrying a small
table from storage.

PAPÁ
Mamá, where should we put this
table?

Miguel and Dante back up to avoid the adults, only to find
Abuelita sweeping the sidewalk behind them! Miguel and Dante
jump into the back into the Rivera courtyard before she sees
them.

ABUELITA
In the courtyard, mijos.

PAPÁ
You want it down by the kitchen?

ABUELITA
Sí. Next to the other one.
Genres: ["Family","Animation","Musical"]

Summary As the sun sets over the Rivera family compound, the celebration of Día de los Muertos kicks off. Abuelita announces the festivities while Mamá teaches her toddler cousins how to properly scatter marigold petals to guide their ancestors' spirits home. Meanwhile, Miguel and his dog Dante sneak around the roof, trying to avoid the adults. Tío Berto and Papá arrive with a table, seeking Mamá's guidance on its placement, as the family comes together in a warm, festive atmosphere filled with tradition.
Strengths
  • Effective blending of family traditions and character development
  • Engaging portrayal of conflict and emotional depth
  • Compelling setup for future plot developments
Weaknesses
  • Limited exploration of secondary characters
  • Potential lack of clarity on Miguel's ultimate goals and motivations

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets the tone for the family's celebration of Día de los Muertos while introducing conflict through Miguel's rebellious actions, adding depth to the storyline.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of blending family traditions with Miguel's desire to pursue music creates a compelling narrative that drives the plot forward and sets up future conflicts and resolutions.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses by introducing Miguel's internal conflict and his aspirations, setting the stage for future developments and character growth within the family dynamic.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique cultural elements of Día de los Muertos and explores the conflict between tradition and individual passion in a fresh and engaging way.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined, with Miguel's rebellious nature and Abuelita's authoritative presence adding depth to the scene and setting up potential character arcs.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel's character undergoes subtle changes as he grapples with his musical aspirations and family expectations, setting the stage for potential growth and development.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music and follow his dreams of becoming a musician, despite his family's disapproval.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to avoid getting caught by his family while sneaking out to play music with his dog, Dante.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's disapproval adds tension to the scene, setting up future confrontations and resolutions.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create suspense and conflict, as Miguel and Dante must navigate around their family members to pursue their goals.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as Miguel defies his family's wishes and pursues his musical dreams, setting up potential consequences and resolutions that will impact the characters and storyline.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, character motivations, and setting up future plot developments, engaging the audience and driving the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected interactions between characters and the suspense of Miguel and Dante trying to avoid getting caught.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Miguel's desire to pursue his passion for music and his family's tradition and expectations for him to follow in their footsteps.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from nostalgia and celebration to concern and rebellion, engaging the audience and setting up emotional stakes for the characters.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the family's traditions, Miguel's aspirations, and the conflict surrounding music, adding layers to the scene and setting up future interactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the lively setting, relatable family dynamics, and the suspense of Miguel and Dante trying to avoid getting caught.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense as Miguel and Dante try to avoid getting caught while also introducing key cultural elements of Día de los Muertos.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a family-oriented animated film, with clear character motivations and interactions.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the festive atmosphere of Día de los Muertos, using vivid imagery and dialogue to convey the importance of the holiday and the family's traditions. However, the transition from the previous scene to this one feels abrupt. The emotional stakes for Miguel are high as he declares his intention to play in Mariachi Plaza, but this scene shifts focus to the family preparations without addressing Miguel's internal conflict or excitement about his upcoming performance.
  • The dialogue is functional but could benefit from more emotional depth. While Mamá's explanation of the marigold petals is informative, it lacks a personal touch that connects her to Miguel's journey. Adding a line that reflects her hopes or fears for Miguel could enhance the emotional resonance of the scene.
  • The physical comedy of Miguel and Dante sneaking around is a nice touch, but it could be heightened. The tension of being caught could be more pronounced, perhaps by incorporating more close calls or humorous interactions with the adults. This would not only add levity but also reinforce Miguel's rebellious spirit.
  • The scene introduces several characters, but their interactions feel somewhat surface-level. Tío Berto and Papá's dialogue is functional but lacks distinct character voices. Each character could have a unique way of expressing their thoughts about the holiday or Miguel's aspirations, which would help to flesh them out and make the scene more engaging.
  • The visual elements are strong, but the scene could benefit from more sensory details. Describing the sounds of the celebration, the scents of the food, or the colors of the decorations would create a richer atmosphere and immerse the audience more fully in the setting.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Miguel reflects on his upcoming performance while observing the festivities. This could serve as a bridge between his declaration in the previous scene and the family preparations, maintaining the emotional stakes.
  • Enhance Mamá's dialogue about the marigold petals by including a personal anecdote or a wish for Miguel's future. This would deepen her character and connect her more closely to Miguel's journey.
  • Increase the tension of Miguel and Dante sneaking around by incorporating more close calls with the adults. For example, they could almost be spotted multiple times, adding a layer of suspense and humor.
  • Give each adult character a distinct voice or perspective on the holiday and Miguel's aspirations. This could be achieved through unique phrases, attitudes, or even playful banter that reflects their personalities.
  • Incorporate more sensory details to enrich the scene. Describe the sounds of laughter, the aroma of traditional foods, or the vibrant colors of the decorations to create a more immersive experience for the audience.



Scene 11 -  Secrets of the Ofrenda
INT. OFRENDA ROOM

Miguel backs out of the courtyard and into the family ofrenda
room. Nearly cornered, he ushers Dante past a sleeping Mamá
Coco. He stashes the dog and the guitar under the ofrenda
table.




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MIGUEL
Get under, get under!

ABUELITA (O.S.)
Miguel!

Miguel straightens up to notice the doorway of the ofrenda
room darkened by three figures.

MIGUEL
Nothing!

His Abuelita and parents stare straight at him. A pit grows
in his stomach; he's been caught.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Mamá -- Papá, I--

Papá lifts his finger to silence his son.

PAPÁ
Miguel...
(beat)
Your Abuelita had the most
wonderful idea!
(beat)
We've all decided -- it's time you
joined us in the workshop!

Abuelita hands Papá a leather apron, which he hangs over
Miguel's shoulders.

MIGUEL
What?!

PAPÁ
No more shining shoes -- you will
be making them! Every day after
school!

Abuelita shuffles toward Miguel squealing. She squeezes his
cheeks, full of pride.

ABUELITA
Our Migueli-ti-ti-ti-to carrying on
the family tradition! And on Día
de los Muertos! Your ancestors
will be so proud!

She gestures to the shoes adorning the ofrenda.




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ABUELITA (CONT’D)
You'll craft huaraches just like
your Tía Victoria.

PAPÁ
And wingtips, like your Papá Julio--

Miguel crosses away from the ofrenda.

MIGUEL
But what if I'm no good at making
shoes?

PAPÁ
Ah, Migue... You have your family
here to guide you...
(beat)
You are a Rivera. And a Rivera
is...?

MIGUEL
...A shoemaker. Through and
through.

Papá swells.

PAPÁ
That's my boy!
(calling out)
Berto, break out the good stuff, I
wanna make a toast!

Papá heads out of the room, Mamá follows. Last is Abuelita,
who smothers Miguel with tons of kisses as she leaves.

With the family gone, Miguel deflates.

Suddenly, a noise comes from the ofrenda. Miguel turns to
find Dante on the bottom tier, licking a plate of mole to his
heart's content. Miguel is horrified!

MIGUEL
Dante! No, Dante, stop!

Miguel pulls the dog away from the ofrenda, but the table
shakes. The frame with Mamá Imelda's photo sways back and
forth, then topples to the ground with a sickening crack.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
No, no, no, no, no! No...

Miguel picks up the old photo of Mamá Imelda, which unfolds
to reveal another portion, hidden all these years;



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the man with no face is revealed to be holding a familiar
skull-headed guitar.

MIGUEL
De la Cruz's guitar...?

MAMÁ COCO
Papá?

Miguel turns, startled. Mamá Coco points a crooked finger at
the picture in his hand.

MAMÁ COCO (CONT'D)
Papá?

Miguel's eyes go wide as the connection dawns on him. Could
it possibly be true?

MIGUEL
Mamá Coco, is your papá... Ernesto
de la Cruz?

MAMÁ COCO
Papá! Papá!

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In the family ofrenda room during Día de los Muertos, Miguel sneaks in with his dog Dante, trying to hide from his family. He is caught by Abuelita and his parents, who express their hopes for him to continue the family shoemaking tradition. While initially excited, Miguel feels pressured and doubts his skills. A playful moment turns tense when Dante's antics cause a photo of Mamá Imelda to fall, revealing a hidden picture of a man with a guitar. This shocking discovery hints at a connection between Mamá Coco and the famous musician Ernesto de la Cruz, leaving Miguel in disbelief.
Strengths
  • Revealing a significant plot point
  • Exploring family dynamics
  • Creating emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Potential lack of subtlety in the revelation of the connection to Ernesto de la Cruz

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces a significant plot point while highlighting Miguel's internal conflict and family dynamics. The emotional impact and character development are well-executed, setting the stage for future revelations.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of family tradition, legacy, and the conflict between pursuing one's passion and honoring family values is central to the scene. The revelation of Miguel's potential lineage to Ernesto de la Cruz adds intrigue and sets up future conflicts and resolutions.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses significantly in this scene, introducing a key revelation that will drive Miguel's character development and the overall narrative. The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's shoemaking tradition is effectively established.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family traditions and individual dreams, blending cultural elements with a personal journey of self-discovery. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed in this scene, with Miguel's internal struggle and family dynamics portrayed convincingly. The revelation of the potential connection to Ernesto de la Cruz adds layers to the characters and sets up future conflicts.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes a significant realization and internal conflict in this scene, setting the stage for his character development and potential transformation. The revelation of his potential lineage to Ernesto de la Cruz marks a turning point for his journey.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to find out the truth about his family's past and his connection to Ernesto de la Cruz. This reflects his deeper desire to understand his identity and pursue his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to avoid getting caught by his family for hiding Dante and the guitar under the ofrenda table. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in maintaining his secret.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's shoemaking tradition creates tension and sets up internal and external conflicts. The revelation of the potential connection to Ernesto de la Cruz adds a new layer of conflict.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Miguel faces the challenge of maintaining his secret while confronting his family's expectations and uncovering a shocking truth about his heritage.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as Miguel discovers a potential connection to a famous musician, challenging his family's traditions and his own aspirations. The scene sets up high stakes for Miguel's future decisions and conflicts.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by introducing a key revelation that will impact Miguel's journey and the overall narrative. It sets up future conflicts, character development, and plot twists.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected revelation about Miguel's connection to Ernesto de la Cruz, which adds a new layer of mystery and intrigue to the story.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the tension between family expectations and individual dreams. Miguel's desire to pursue music clashes with his family's shoemaking tradition and their expectations for him to join the workshop.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes emotions of pride, confusion, and discovery, particularly in Miguel's realization of a potential family connection to a famous musician. The family dynamics and Miguel's internal struggle add depth to the emotional impact.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the family's values, Miguel's conflict, and the emotional moments in the scene. The interactions between the characters reveal their relationships and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional intensity, character development, and the revelation of a key plot twist that drives the narrative forward.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to a climactic moment of revelation that propels the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character dialogue, and transitions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively building tension and revealing key plot points through character interactions and revelations.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension as Miguel tries to hide his actions from his family, which creates a relatable conflict for the audience. However, the stakes could be heightened further by emphasizing Miguel's emotional turmoil about being caught versus his desire to pursue music.
  • The dialogue between Miguel and his family feels authentic and captures the familial dynamics well. However, the transition from Miguel's initial panic to the family's enthusiastic support for him to join the shoemaking tradition feels abrupt. A more gradual shift in tone could enhance the emotional impact.
  • Abuelita's pride in Miguel continuing the family tradition is a strong emotional beat, but it could be more impactful if Miguel's internal struggle about his identity as a musician versus a shoemaker was explored in greater depth. This would add layers to his character and make the audience more invested in his journey.
  • The reveal of the hidden photo and its connection to Ernesto de la Cruz is a pivotal moment, but it could benefit from a stronger visual cue or a more dramatic buildup. The moment feels slightly rushed, and allowing for a brief pause or reaction from Miguel could amplify the significance of this discovery.
  • Mamá Coco's confusion adds a poignant touch, but her dialogue could be more impactful if it included a line that reflects her emotional state or memories about her father. This would deepen the audience's understanding of her character and the weight of the revelation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel reflects on his love for music before being interrupted by his family, which would set up a stronger contrast between his passion and the family's expectations.
  • Introduce a brief moment of hesitation or doubt from Miguel before he is caught, allowing the audience to feel his internal conflict more acutely.
  • Enhance the emotional stakes by including a line from Miguel that expresses his fear of disappointing his family, which would make his eventual discovery of the photo more impactful.
  • Allow for a moment of silence or a close-up shot on Miguel's face after he discovers the hidden photo, emphasizing the weight of the revelation and giving the audience time to absorb its significance.
  • Consider adding a line from Mamá Coco that hints at her memories of her father, which would enrich her character and provide a deeper emotional connection to the revelation about Ernesto de la Cruz.



Scene 12 -  A Musical Revelation
INT. ROOFTOP HIDEOUT

Miguel goes to his secret ofrenda, to the record album of
Ernesto de la Cruz. He compares the guitar in the family
photo with the guitar on the sleeve. An exact match!

MIGUEL
Ha, ha!


EXT. ROOFTOP

Miguel runs to the edge of the roof, overlooking the
courtyard, photo in one hand, guitar in the other.

MIGUEL
Papá! Papá!

His parents stop, looking up at Miguel.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
It's him! I know who my great-
great grandfather was!




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MAMÁ
Miguel! Get down from there!

MIGUEL
Mamá Coco's father was Ernesto de
la Cruz!

PAPÁ
What are you talking about?

Miguel whips off his shoemaker's apron, striking a pose with
the guitar.

MIGUEL
I'm gonna be a musician!

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary Miguel excitedly discovers a connection between his family and the musician Ernesto de la Cruz, believing him to be Mamá Coco's father. He rushes to share this news with his confused and concerned parents on the rooftop, where he expresses his ambition to become a musician. The scene captures the tension between Miguel's enthusiasm for music and his parents' worries for his safety.
Strengths
  • Revealing a shocking family connection
  • Building excitement and determination in the protagonist
  • Setting up key conflicts and motivations
Weaknesses
  • Potential lack of foreshadowing for the ancestry revelation

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene effectively introduces a major plot twist that propels the protagonist's character development and sets up the central conflict of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of discovering a hidden family connection to a famous musician adds depth and intrigue to the story, setting up a compelling narrative arc.

Plot: 9

The plot takes a significant turn with the revelation of the protagonist's ancestry, driving the story forward and setting up key conflicts and motivations.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the theme of family traditions and pursuing dreams, with authentic character actions and dialogue that resonate with the audience.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters' reactions to the revelation of the protagonist's ancestry add depth and emotion to the scene, showcasing their relationships and motivations.

Character Changes: 9

The protagonist undergoes a significant change in this scene, shifting from uncertainty to determination as he discovers his musical heritage.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to discover his family's musical heritage and pursue his passion for music, reflecting his deeper desire for self-expression and identity.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to prove his family wrong about their ban on music and pursue his dream of becoming a musician, reflecting the immediate challenge he faces in following his passion.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene primarily revolves around the protagonist's desire to pursue music against his family's wishes, setting up internal and external conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing resistance from his family's traditions and expectations, creating uncertainty and conflict.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as the protagonist decides to pursue his musical dreams against his family's wishes, setting up potential conflicts and challenges.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a major plot twist and setting up key conflicts and motivations for the protagonist, advancing the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected revelation about Miguel's great-great grandfather and his decision to pursue music against his family's wishes.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict is evident between Miguel's desire for self-expression and his family's tradition of shoemaking, challenging his beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene elicits emotions of excitement, surprise, and determination, engaging the audience and setting up a strong emotional connection to the protagonist.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the protagonist's excitement and determination, as well as the family's reactions to the revelation, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional stakes, cultural authenticity, and character dynamics that draw the audience into Miguel's journey of self-discovery.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotion, leading to Miguel's pivotal decision to pursue music.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution that advance the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds on the emotional stakes established in previous scenes, as Miguel's discovery about his great-great-grandfather connects directly to his passion for music. This revelation is a pivotal moment in the narrative, and the excitement Miguel expresses is palpable.
  • The dialogue is energetic and captures Miguel's youthful exuberance, but it could benefit from more depth. While the excitement is clear, the stakes of this revelation could be heightened by including a line that reflects Miguel's internal conflict about pursuing music against his family's wishes.
  • The visual elements are strong, particularly the contrast between Miguel's secret rooftop hideout and the family courtyard below. However, the scene could be enhanced by incorporating more sensory details, such as the sounds of the celebration below or the feel of the guitar in Miguel's hands, to immerse the audience further.
  • The pacing of the scene is brisk, which works well for conveying Miguel's excitement. However, a moment of pause after his discovery could allow the audience to absorb the significance of the moment before Miguel rushes to share it with his family. This could also create a stronger emotional impact.
  • The parents' reactions are somewhat generic and could be more nuanced. Instead of simply expressing confusion, they could reflect a mix of concern and disbelief, which would add layers to their characters and the family dynamic.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line of internal monologue or a brief reflection from Miguel that highlights his emotional struggle between family expectations and his passion for music. This could deepen the audience's connection to his character.
  • Incorporate sensory details to enhance the atmosphere of the scene. Describe the sounds of the Día de los Muertos celebration below or the texture of the guitar to create a more immersive experience.
  • Introduce a moment of hesitation or contemplation for Miguel after his discovery before he rushes to share it with his family. This could heighten the emotional stakes and allow the audience to fully appreciate the significance of his revelation.
  • Revise the parents' dialogue to reflect a more complex emotional response. Instead of just confusion, they could express concern for Miguel's safety or disappointment in his choice, adding depth to their characters.
  • Consider using a visual cue, such as a close-up of the family photo and the album cover, to emphasize the connection Miguel is making. This could serve as a powerful visual metaphor for his journey of self-discovery.



Scene 13 -  A Family Divided
EXT. COURTYARD - EARLY EVENING

Miguel's guitar is cast at his feet, along with his de la
Cruz albums. The whole family encircles the boy.

ABUELITA
What is all this? You keep secrets
from your own family?

TÍO BERTO
It's all that time he spends in the
plaza...

TÍA GLORIA
...Fills his head with crazy
fantasies!

MIGUEL
It's not a fantasy!

Miguel hands Papá the photo and points to the skull guitar.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
That man was Ernesto de la Cruz!
The greatest musician of all time!

PAPÁ
We've never known anything about
this man. But whoever he was, he
still abandoned his family. This
is no future for my son.




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MIGUEL
But Papá, you said my family would
guide me! Well de la Cruz IS my
family! I'm supposed to play
music!

ABUELITA
Never! That man's music was a
curse! I will not allow it!

MIGUEL
If you would just let--

MAMÁ
(warning)
Miguel--

PAPÁ
You will listen to your family. No
more music.

MIGUEL
Just listen to me play--

PAPÁ
End of argument.

Miguel lifts his guitar to play when Abuelita snatches the
instrument away. She points to the man in the photo.

ABUELITA
You want to end up like that man?
Forgotten? Left off your family's
ofrenda?!

MIGUEL
I don't care if I'm on some stupid
ofrenda!

Gasps from the family. Abuelita's brow hardens. She lifts
the guitar in the air.

MIGUEL
No!

PAPÁ
Mamá...

Abuelita smashes it to bits!

ABUELITA
There. No guitar, no music.
(softening)
(MORE)

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ABUELITA (CONT'D)
Come. You'll feel better after you
eat with your family.

She reaches out to comfort Miguel, but he is hurt beyond
repair.

MIGUEL
I don't wanna be in this family!

He snatches the photo from Papá and bolts out of the
hacienda.

PAPÁ
Miguel! MIGUEL!
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In the courtyard during early evening, Miguel's family confronts him about his passion for music, particularly his admiration for Ernesto de la Cruz. Despite Miguel's passionate defense of his dreams, his family, led by Abuelita, vehemently opposes music due to its association with abandonment. Tensions escalate when Abuelita destroys Miguel's guitar, symbolizing the family's rejection of his aspirations. Hurt and frustrated, Miguel declares he no longer wants to be part of the family and storms out, leaving behind a shattered dream.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Potential for cliché family conflict dynamics

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally charged, well-paced, and crucial for character development and plot progression.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of family conflict and musical rebellion is compelling and drives the scene forward.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly with Miguel's decision to pursue music against his family's wishes.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the conflict between tradition and personal ambition, blending cultural elements with universal themes of family and self-discovery. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and emotionally resonant, adding depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, and their interactions feel authentic and impactful.

Character Changes: 9

Miguel undergoes a significant change by standing up to his family and asserting his musical aspirations.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music and follow his dreams of becoming a musician, despite his family's disapproval. This reflects his deeper need for self-expression and fulfillment.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to convince his family to support his musical aspirations and allow him to pursue his passion. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in reconciling his dreams with his family's expectations.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Miguel and his family is intense and drives the emotional core of the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting values and emotions driving the conflict between characters. Miguel's struggle to assert his identity and pursue his dreams is met with resistance from his family, creating a compelling obstacle for him to overcome.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high as Miguel risks alienating his family to pursue his dreams.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by setting up a major conflict and revealing important family secrets.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected emotional outbursts, shifting power dynamics, and unresolved conflicts between characters. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between tradition and personal ambition. Miguel's desire to pursue music clashes with his family's values and beliefs, leading to a struggle between honoring tradition and following one's dreams.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene evokes strong emotions, particularly in Miguel's defiance and the family's reaction.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotional turmoil and conflict within the family.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional intensity, relatable conflict, and strong character dynamics. The audience is drawn into the family drama and invested in Miguel's journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension, escalating conflicts, and highlighting emotional beats. The rhythm of the dialogue and action keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' struggles.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions. The formatting enhances the readability and visual impact of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character arcs and conflict resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness, building tension and emotional impact.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the escalating tension between Miguel and his family regarding his passion for music. The dialogue is sharp and reveals the deep-rooted conflict within the family, particularly Abuelita's strong aversion to music due to its association with abandonment. However, the emotional stakes could be heightened by incorporating more physical actions or reactions from Miguel that reflect his internal struggle, such as pacing or fidgeting with the guitar before it is destroyed.
  • The use of dialogue is strong, but some lines could be more impactful. For instance, when Miguel declares, 'I don't care if I'm on some stupid ofrenda!', it feels somewhat dismissive. This could be an opportunity to deepen his emotional connection to the ofrenda and what it represents, perhaps by having him express a desire to be remembered for his music rather than just being part of the family legacy.
  • The climax of the scene, where Abuelita smashes the guitar, is a powerful moment that visually and symbolically represents the family's rejection of Miguel's dreams. However, the aftermath of this action could be explored further. How does the family react to Miguel's declaration that he doesn't want to be part of the family? This could add layers to the family dynamics and show the impact of their actions on Miguel's psyche.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but it could benefit from a moment of silence or a pause after the guitar is destroyed. This would allow the weight of the moment to settle in for both Miguel and the audience, emphasizing the gravity of the situation and Miguel's emotional turmoil.
  • The setting of the courtyard is appropriate for the family confrontation, but it could be enhanced with more sensory details. Describing the sounds of the Día de los Muertos celebration in the background could create a stark contrast to the tension in the courtyard, highlighting Miguel's isolation in this moment.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more physicality to Miguel's character in this scene to better convey his emotional state. For example, he could be gripping the guitar tightly or pacing back and forth as he argues with his family.
  • Revise Miguel's line about the ofrenda to reflect a deeper emotional connection. Perhaps he could express a longing to be remembered for his music, which would make his rejection of the family legacy more poignant.
  • After Abuelita destroys the guitar, include a moment of silence or a reaction shot of Miguel that captures his shock and hurt. This pause could heighten the emotional impact of the moment.
  • Enhance the sensory details of the setting to create a more immersive experience. Describe the sounds, smells, and sights of the Día de los Muertos celebration happening around them to contrast with the tension in the courtyard.
  • Explore the family's reactions to Miguel's declaration that he doesn't want to be part of the family. This could add depth to the family dynamics and show the consequences of their actions on Miguel's emotional state.



Scene 14 -  Seizing the Moment
EXT. SIDE STREET

Miguel bursts out of the compound, desperate to get away.
Dante, nose buried in a trash bag, hears Miguel and chases
after him. Miguel runs past a poster for the plaza “TALENT
SHOW.”


EXT. MARIACHI PLAZA - EVENING

Miguel approaches a STAGE MANAGER in the gazebo.

MIGUEL
I wanna play in the plaza. Like de
la Cruz! Can I still sign-up?

STAGE MANAGER
You got an instrument?

MIGUEL
No... But if I can borrow a guitar--

STAGE MANAGER
Musicians gotta bring their own
instruments...
(walking away)
You find a guitar, kid, I'll put
you on the list.

Miguel looks distraught.

MOMENTS LATER:

Miguel approaches any musician he can find.




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MIGUEL
Excuse me, can I borrow your
guitar?

MUSICIAN #1
Sorry, muchacho.

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MIGUEL
You guys have a spare guitar?

MUSICIAN #2
No.

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MIGUEL
I need a guitar, just for a little
bit--

MUSICIAN #3
Get outta here, kid!

Disheartened, Miguel walks away. He finds himself facing the
statue of de la Cruz.

MIGUEL
Great-great grandfather... What am
I supposed to do?

No answer. Miguel's gaze falls on a plaque at the base of
the statue that reads "Seize Your Moment!" Miguel looks at
the photo in his hand. He moves his thumb to reveal the
skull head guitar. Then, a firework illuminates the skull
head guitar that the statue holds. Miguel gets an idea.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In a desperate bid to join a plaza talent show, Miguel escapes the compound only to find he needs his own guitar. After facing rejection from several musicians, he feels defeated until he stands before a statue of his great-great-grandfather, de la Cruz. Inspired by the statue's message to 'Seize Your Moment,' Miguel notices the skull head guitar in its hands, igniting a new idea for his performance.
Strengths
  • Clear character motivations
  • Emotional depth
  • Tension and conflict
Weaknesses
  • Limited dialogue variety
  • Predictable outcome

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys Miguel's internal conflict and passion for music, setting up a crucial turning point in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of following one's dreams despite familial expectations is well-developed and drives the scene forward.

Plot: 8

The plot advances as Miguel makes a bold decision to participate in the talent show, setting the stage for potential conflict and character development.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of pursuing dreams through music, blending cultural elements with personal struggles. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Miguel, are well-defined and their motivations are clear, adding depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes a significant change as he decides to pursue his musical dreams despite his family's disapproval, setting up potential growth and conflict.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to prove himself as a musician and follow in the footsteps of his idol, de la Cruz. This reflects his deeper desire for recognition, acceptance, and a sense of belonging.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to find a guitar to perform in the plaza talent show. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in pursuing his passion for music.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel and his family regarding his musical aspirations adds tension and drama to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and obstacles for Miguel, keeping the audience engaged and uncertain of the outcome.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high as Miguel risks alienating his family and pursuing his dreams, adding tension and urgency to the scene.

Story Forward: 8

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a crucial decision point for Miguel and setting up future conflicts and developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in Miguel's interactions with the musicians, where the audience is unsure of how he will overcome the obstacle of finding a guitar.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the idea of seizing the moment and taking risks to achieve one's dreams. Miguel's belief in following his passion clashes with the practical limitations he faces in borrowing a guitar.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene elicits a range of emotions, from Miguel's desperation to his determination, engaging the audience in his journey.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension between Miguel and his family, as well as Miguel's determination to pursue his passion for music.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it captures the audience's emotions through Miguel's struggles and aspirations, creating a sense of empathy and investment in his journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional depth, enhancing the audience's connection to Miguel's journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting is clear and concise, following the expected format for a screenplay in its genre.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a setup, conflict, and resolution, adhering to the expected format for a character-driven narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's desperation and determination to pursue his passion for music, which is a central theme of the story. However, the transition from the previous scene to this one feels abrupt. The emotional weight of Miguel's confrontation with his family could be better reflected in his actions and demeanor as he escapes the compound.
  • The dialogue is straightforward and serves its purpose, but it lacks emotional depth. The Stage Manager's responses could be more nuanced to reflect the challenges Miguel faces, perhaps showing a hint of sympathy or understanding for his situation, which would enhance the emotional stakes.
  • The montage of Miguel asking various musicians for a guitar is a good visual representation of his struggle, but it could benefit from more variety in the musicians' reactions. Instead of all being dismissive, including one or two who show a glimmer of encouragement or empathy could add complexity to the scene.
  • The moment Miguel stands before the statue of de la Cruz is pivotal, but it could be more visually striking. Describing the statue in more detail or incorporating the atmosphere around it (like the sounds of the plaza or the reactions of passersby) could heighten the moment's significance.
  • The 'Seize Your Moment!' plaque is a strong thematic element, but it feels a bit too on-the-nose. Consider integrating this message more subtly, perhaps through Miguel's internal thoughts or a more indirect visual cue that leads him to the idea of the skull head guitar.
Suggestions
  • Enhance the emotional transition from the previous scene by showing Miguel's internal struggle as he escapes. Consider adding a moment of reflection or a brief flashback that highlights his passion for music and the pain of his family's rejection.
  • Revise the Stage Manager's dialogue to include a more empathetic response, perhaps acknowledging Miguel's passion while still maintaining the practical requirement of bringing an instrument.
  • Introduce a wider range of reactions from the musicians Miguel approaches. This could include a musician who offers advice or encouragement, which would provide a contrast to the dismissive responses and add depth to Miguel's experience.
  • Add descriptive details to the statue of de la Cruz and the surrounding environment to create a more immersive atmosphere. This could include sensory details like sounds, smells, or the energy of the plaza, enhancing the moment's impact.
  • Consider rephrasing the 'Seize Your Moment!' message to make it feel more organic. This could be done through Miguel's thoughts or a more subtle visual cue that leads him to the idea of the skull head guitar, allowing the theme to resonate without being overly explicit.



Scene 15 -  A Strum in the Shadows
EXT. CEMETERY - MOMENTS LATER

A sea of candles and flowers, families gathered at graves.

Miguel sneaks through the cemetery unnoticed, slipping from
one shadow to the next.

Dante suddenly catches up to Miguel. He barks excitedly.

MIGUEL
No, no, no, no, no, Dante stop!
Cállate! Shhh!

Miguel swipes a chicken leg off a neighboring grave, and
chucks it. Dante bounds after the food.



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EXT. DE LA CRUZ'S MAUSOLEUM

Miguel slinks around the side of the tomb. He looks in one
of the windows.

Inside, the famous guitar hangs above the crypt. Fireworks
pop; bursts of light glint off the instrument. It seems to
beckon him. He tries the window but it’s locked.

More fireworks shoot into the sky.

MIGUEL
I'm sorry...

Timing to the explosions, Miguel throws his shoulder into the
rusted-shut window pane and forces it open with a scraping
KRRRR-LANK! He slinks inside the tomb.


INT. DE LA CRUZ’S MAUSOLEUM

Miguel drops down to the mausoleum floor. The noise from
outside is muffled. He climbs onto the crypt, slightly
moving the lid. He stifles a gasp.

He crawls over the marble sarcophagus and comes face-to-face
with the famed guitar. Miguel wipes away a layer of dust,
revealing the rich painted wood beneath. He looks up to the
portrait of de la Cruz.

MIGUEL
Señor de la Cruz? Please don't be
mad. I'm Miguel, your great-great
grandson... I need to borrow this.

Heart in his throat, Miguel lifts the guitar off its mount.
Unbeknownst to him, some marigold petals in the mausoleum
begin to sparkle.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Our family thinks music is a curse.
None of them understand, but I know
you would have. You would've told
me to follow my heart. To seize my
moment!

He backs up, in full view of the painting.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
So if it's all right with you, I'm
gonna play in the plaza, just like
you did!




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Confidence building, he strums it once.

The air around him vibrates -- radiating like a shock wave.
The petals on the ground whirl and surge with light for just
a moment. Miguel is visibly taken aback. What just
happened?

Suddenly, a flashlight shines in the window of the mausoleum.

VOICES (O.S.)
The guitar! It's gone! Somebody
stole de la Cruz's guitar! The
window's broken, look.

Miguel hears keys jangling and the door unlocking. A
GROUNDSKEEPER enters with a flashlight.

GROUNDSKEEPER
Alright, who's in there?

Startled, Miguel puts down the guitar.

MIGUEL
I... I'm sorry! It's not what it
looks like! De la Cruz is my...

The groundskeeper walks straight through Miguel! He doesn't
even see him!

GROUNDSKEEPER
There's nobody here!
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Adventure"]

Summary In a vibrant cemetery filled with families celebrating their loved ones, Miguel sneaks in with his dog, Dante, to retrieve a coveted guitar from the mausoleum of the famous musician de la Cruz. Despite his family's disapproval of music, Miguel's passion drives him to break in and play the guitar, triggering a magical reaction with sparkling marigold petals. However, his moment of joy is interrupted when a groundskeeper enters, creating a tense situation as Miguel must hide while navigating the risks of his secret mission.
Strengths
  • Building tension
  • Revealing hidden connections
  • Emotional impact
Weaknesses
  • Potential for cliché with the 'borrowing a famous musician's guitar' trope

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene effectively builds tension and intrigue, setting up a pivotal moment in Miguel's journey to pursue his musical dreams. The emotional impact and high stakes make it a compelling and memorable scene.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of Miguel sneaking into de la Cruz's mausoleum to borrow his guitar is a pivotal moment that drives the plot forward and reveals a hidden connection between the characters. It adds depth to the story and Miguel's character arc.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is crucial in advancing Miguel's journey and setting up key conflicts and revelations. It propels the story forward and deepens the emotional stakes for the characters.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of pursuing one's dreams and the conflict between tradition and individuality. The authenticity of Miguel's actions and dialogue adds depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with Miguel's determination and defiance shining through in his actions. Abuelita's strictness and the family's disapproval add layers to the conflict and tension.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes a significant change in the scene, defying his family's expectations and taking a bold step towards pursuing his musical dreams. This sets up a transformative arc for his character.

Internal Goal: 9

Miguel's internal goal is to connect with his deceased great-great grandfather, de la Cruz, through music. He seeks validation and understanding for his passion for music, which is not accepted by his family.

External Goal: 8

Miguel's external goal is to borrow de la Cruz's guitar and play in the plaza, following in his footsteps. This reflects his desire to pursue his musical dreams despite familial opposition.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is high, as Miguel defies his family's wishes and risks getting caught while trying to borrow de la Cruz's guitar. The tension and stakes are palpable, driving the narrative forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing both external threats like the groundskeeper and internal conflicts with his family's beliefs, creating a sense of uncertainty and danger.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are high, as Miguel risks getting caught while sneaking into de la Cruz's mausoleum to borrow his guitar. The consequences of his actions could have far-reaching implications for his family and his dreams.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, revealing a hidden connection between Miguel's family and de la Cruz, setting up key conflicts and motivations for the characters. It propels the narrative towards a crucial turning point.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected supernatural elements and the tension of Miguel's risky actions, keeping the audience on edge.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the value of following one's passion and dreams, even in the face of familial disapproval. Miguel's belief in the importance of music clashes with his family's belief that it is a curse.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a strong emotional impact, as Miguel's determination and defiance evoke empathy and tension. The revelation of the hidden connection adds depth and intrigue, engaging the audience emotionally.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys Miguel's inner turmoil and determination, as well as the family dynamics and conflicting emotions. It adds depth to the scene and enhances the character interactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it combines suspense, emotion, and magical elements to draw the audience into Miguel's journey of self-discovery and defiance.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional resonance, leading to a climactic moment of decision for the protagonist.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene is formatted in a clear and engaging manner, with descriptive language and dialogue that enhance the visual and emotional impact of the narrative.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a well-paced structure that builds tension and emotional depth, leading to a climactic moment of decision for the protagonist.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension and excitement as Miguel sneaks through the cemetery, showcasing his determination to pursue music despite his family's disapproval. However, the initial setup could benefit from a clearer sense of urgency. While Miguel is sneaking around, it would enhance the stakes if there were more immediate threats or obstacles he faces, such as the potential for being caught by family members or other cemetery visitors.
  • The dialogue is minimal, which works well for the suspenseful atmosphere, but it could be enriched with internal thoughts or voiceovers from Miguel that express his emotional conflict more deeply. This would help the audience connect with his motivations and fears as he navigates this pivotal moment.
  • The magical realism element, where marigold petals begin to sparkle when Miguel plays the guitar, is a strong visual cue that signifies the importance of music in his life. However, the transition from the physical act of playing to the magical reaction could be more pronounced. Consider adding a sensory description of how the music feels to Miguel or how it affects the environment around him, enhancing the magical moment.
  • The introduction of the groundskeeper is a clever twist, revealing Miguel's ghostly state. However, the scene could benefit from a more dramatic reaction from Miguel upon realizing he is invisible. This moment could serve as a turning point, emphasizing the gravity of his situation and the consequences of his actions.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the climax where Miguel plays the guitar could be drawn out slightly longer to build anticipation. Allowing a moment of silence before he strums the guitar could heighten the tension and make the subsequent magical reaction more impactful.
Suggestions
  • Introduce a more immediate threat or obstacle for Miguel as he sneaks through the cemetery to heighten the tension and stakes.
  • Incorporate internal thoughts or voiceovers from Miguel to deepen the emotional connection with the audience.
  • Enhance the magical realism by adding sensory descriptions of how the music affects Miguel and the environment around him.
  • Show a more dramatic reaction from Miguel when he realizes he is invisible to the groundskeeper, emphasizing the significance of his ghostly state.
  • Consider extending the moment before Miguel strums the guitar to build anticipation and make the magical reaction more impactful.



Scene 16 -  A Night in the Cemetery
EXT. CEMETERY - NIGHT

A panicked Miguel runs out, trying to figure out what's going
on! But the people in the cemetery walk through him too.

Suddenly he hears a familiar voice.

MAMÁ
Miguel!

Miguel turns to see Papá and Mamá still searching for him.

MIGUEL
Mamá!

PAPÁ
Miguel! Come home!

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PAPÁ
Where are you, Miguel?!

Frantic, Miguel trips and falls into an open grave. A nearby
woman gasps and peeks over the ledge of the grave.

WOMAN
Dios mío! Little boy, are you
okay?

She reaches into the grave.

WOMAN (CONT’D)
Here, let me help you.

Miguel takes her hand and she pulls him out.

MIGUEL
Thanks, I--

They see each other face to face. The woman is a skeleton!
Miguel screams! She does too!

Miguel backs away. He turns to see another skeleton. He
falls backwards and scoots away frantically. He bumps into
another skeleton whose head falls off and lands in Miguel's
hands.

SKELETON HEAD
Do you mind?

MIGUEL
Ahhh!

SKELETON HEAD
Ahhh!

MIGUEL
AHHH!

Miguel tosses the head away from him and turns to see the
whole cemetery is teeming with skeletons! And they can all
see him!

He races off and hides behind a grave. After a moment, he
peeks over the headstone to watch the skeletons engaging with
their living families.

One couple dances.

Another man reaches for offerings on his grave, which
solidify in his hands when he takes them.




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A couple of skeletons coo over a toddler.

SKELETON ABUELA
Look how big she's getting!

Suddenly Dante surprises Miguel and licks him on the cheek.
Miguel screams.

MIGUEL
Dante?! You can see me? W-wait!
What’s going on?!

Dante barks, points, and bounds through the crowd.

MIGUEL
Dante! Dante!

Miguel gives chase until -– BAM! He runs smack into a
mustached skeleton and falls to the ground. The skeleton's
bones break apart and scatter. The head pops up.

MIGUEL
I'm sorry, I'm sorry...

PAPÁ JULIO
Miguel?!

Miguel tries to gather the scattered bones.

TÍA ROSITA
Miguel?

TÍA VICTORIA
Miguel?

The bones magically pull away from Miguel.

PAPÁ JULIO
You're here! HERE here!

PAPÁ JULIO reconstitutes himself.

PAPÁ JULIO (CONT'D)
And you can see us?!

TÍA ROSITA charges through Papá Julio, sending his bones
scattering again. She grabs Miguel, hugging him tight.

TÍA ROSITA
Our Migueli-ti-ti-ti-ti-to!

Miguel, smothered by Rosita's ample ribcage, struggles for
air.



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MIGUEL
(muffled)
Remind me how I know you?

TÍA ROSITA
We're your family, mijo!

Tía Rosita's ofrenda photo flashes in Miguel's memory.

MIGUEL
Tía... Rosita?

TÍA ROSITA
Sí!

He looks at Papá Julio, whose head is still turned the wrong
way. TÍA VICTORIA straightens it.

MIGUEL
Papá Julio?

PAPÁ JULIO
Hola.

MIGUEL
Tía Victoria?

Tía Victoria pokes Miguel's cheek, skeptical.

TÍA VICTORIA
He doesn't seem entirely dead.

A living person ambles through Miguel’s non-corporeal form.

TÍA ROSITA
He's not quite alive either...

PAPÁ JULIO
We need Mamá Imelda. She’ll know
how to fix this!

Suddenly twin skeleton gents run, huffing, toward the family.

TÍO FELIPE
(huffing)
Oye!

TÍO OSCAR
(winded)
It's Mamá Imelda--




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TÍO FELIPE
(huffing)
--She couldn't cross over!

The others gasp.

TÍO OSCAR
She's stuck--

TÍO FELIPE
--On the other side!

Miguel sees pictures of his Tío Oscar and Tío Felipe flash in
his memory.

MIGUEL
Tío Oscar? Tío Felipe?

TÍO OSCAR
Oh, hey Miguel.

Tía Victoria turns her gaze on Miguel.

TÍA VICTORIA
I have a feeling this has something
to do with you.

TÍA ROSITA
But if Mamá Imelda can't come to
us...

PAPÁ JULIO
...Then we are going to her!
Vámonos!

Papá Julio grabs Miguel by the arm and the family rushes
through the cemetery, trailed by Dante.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary Miguel finds himself in a dark cemetery, panicking as he realizes he can see and hear his deceased family members, who cannot see him. After falling into an open grave and encountering a skeleton woman, he is frightened but soon discovers that his family is excited to see him. They discuss the need to find Mamá Imelda, who is stuck on the other side, and decide to rush through the cemetery together to locate her.
Strengths
  • Innovative concept
  • Emotional depth
  • Family dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Potential confusion for younger audiences
  • Lack of clarity in some character interactions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces a new fantastical element to the story while maintaining a sense of mystery and emotional depth. It sets up a significant turning point for the protagonist and the overall plot.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the scene, introducing a world of animated skeletons during a traditional Mexican celebration, is innovative and adds depth to the story's themes of family, identity, and the afterlife.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene advances the story by revealing new information about the protagonist's family history and setting up a major conflict related to the protagonist's desires and the family's expectations.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of the afterlife and the interactions between the living and the dead. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the unique world-building.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters in the scene, particularly the skeleton family members, add depth and humor to the story, showcasing the importance of family bonds and the afterlife in the narrative.

Character Changes: 7

The protagonist undergoes a significant realization about his family history and his own identity, leading to a shift in his goals and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to understand what is happening and to reconnect with his deceased family members. This reflects his deeper need for belonging, connection, and understanding of his family's history.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to find a way to communicate with his family members and figure out how to navigate the afterlife. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing of being in a new and unfamiliar environment.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene arises from the protagonist's desire to pursue his musical dreams against his family's expectations, setting up a compelling internal and external struggle.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Miguel faces challenges in understanding the afterlife and communicating with his family members. The uncertainty of the situation adds to the tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as the protagonist faces a dilemma between following his musical dreams and honoring his family's traditions, setting the stage for a pivotal decision.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing crucial information about the protagonist's family background and setting up a major conflict that will drive the narrative forward.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns, such as the revelation of the skeletons and the family's plan to reach Mamá Imelda. The audience is kept on their toes and eager to see what happens next.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the boundary between life and death, and the idea of family bonds transcending death. This challenges Miguel's beliefs about the afterlife and the importance of family connections.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from fear and confusion to joy and wonder, creating a memorable and emotionally resonant moment in the story.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the emotions and relationships between the characters, adding humor and heart to the fantastical elements of the story.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, emotion, and supernatural elements. The interactions between the characters and the unique setting keep the audience intrigued and invested in Miguel's journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, while also allowing for moments of humor and emotion. The rhythm of the scene keeps the audience engaged and invested in Miguel's story.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue. It is easy to follow and visually engaging.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's panic and confusion as he navigates the cemetery, which is a crucial moment in his journey. The use of humor, particularly with the skeleton interactions, adds levity to an otherwise tense situation, making it engaging for the audience.
  • The dialogue is lively and reflects the characters' personalities well. Miguel's frantic responses contrast nicely with the calmness of the skeletons, creating a humorous juxtaposition that enhances the scene's comedic elements.
  • The visual imagery of the cemetery filled with skeletons interacting with their living families is vivid and imaginative, effectively conveying the magical realism of the story. The description of Miguel's interactions with the skeletons, especially the humorous moments like the head falling off, adds to the whimsical tone.
  • However, the pacing could be improved. The scene feels slightly rushed, especially when Miguel encounters the skeletons. Slowing down the moment when he first realizes he can see them could heighten the emotional impact and allow for more character development.
  • The transition from Miguel's panic to the reunion with his family is somewhat abrupt. While the humor is effective, it might benefit from a more gradual build-up to the family reunion, allowing for a deeper exploration of Miguel's emotions as he realizes he is not alone.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of stillness where Miguel processes the fact that he can see and hear the skeletons before the humor kicks in. This could deepen the emotional stakes and enhance the audience's connection to his character.
  • Expand on the interactions with the skeletons to include more dialogue that reveals their personalities and relationships with Miguel. This could help to establish a stronger emotional connection and provide context for Miguel's feelings of confusion and fear.
  • Incorporate more sensory details to enhance the atmosphere of the cemetery. Describing the sounds, smells, and sights could immerse the audience further into the scene and make it feel more alive.
  • Consider using Miguel's internal thoughts or voiceover to express his feelings of fear and confusion more explicitly. This could provide insight into his character and make his journey more relatable to the audience.
  • Finally, ensure that the transition to the family reunion feels more organic. Perhaps include a moment where Miguel hesitates before joining his family, reflecting on his feelings of isolation before being embraced by them.



Scene 17 -  Crossing the Marigold Bridge
EXT. CEMETERY - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel and his family weave through the graves, rounding a
corner.

His gaze falls upon a glowing MARIGOLD BRIDGE arching before
them.

MIGUEL
Whoa...

The bridge extends into the mist. A stream of skeletons
amble across for the holiday.




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The family passes through an invisible barrier onto the
bridge. Their bodies change from ghostly to solid. Miguel
hesitates at the threshold.

PAPÁ JULIO
Come on, Miguel. It's ok.

Miguel follows after the family, the petals glowing under his
feet. Dante takes off.

MIGUEL
Dante! Dante! Dante, wait up!

Miguel runs after Dante, finally catching up to the dog as he
rolls in the petals at the crest of the bridge. He sneezes
some petals into Miguel's face.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
You gotta stay with me, boy. We
don't know... where...

Out of the mist, the sparkling cityscape of the Land of the
Dead emerges. It's breathtaking. His family sidles up.

MIGUEL
This isn't a dream, then. You're
all really out there...

TÍA VICTORIA
You thought we weren't?

MIGUEL
Well I don't know, I thought it
might've been one of those made up
things that adults tell kids...
like... vitamins.

TÍA VICTORIA
Miguel, vitamins are a real thing.

MIGUEL
Well, now I'm thinking maybe they
could be...

As skeletons pass in the other direction, Miguel receives
some strange looks. A little skeleton girl gasps, pointing
at him.

SKELETON MOTHER
Mija, it's not nice to stare at--
(seeing Miguel)
Ay! Santa Maria!




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The woman goes wide-eyed, her head turning backwards to gawk
at Miguel as she walks in the opposite direction. Miguel
puts up his hood.

The Riveras continue on toward an arrivals area on the far
side of the bridge. Miguel sees fantastical creatures
crawling, flying, making nests in the nearby architecture.

MIGUEL
Are those...? Alebrijes! But
those are--

TÍO OSCAR
REAL alebrijes. Spirit
creatures...

TÍA ROSITA
They guide souls on their
journey...

TÍO FELIPE
Watch your step, they make caquitas
everywhere.

They get to the far edge of the Marigold Bridge.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary Miguel and his family traverse a mystical cemetery and discover a glowing Marigold Bridge leading to the Land of the Dead. As they step onto the bridge, they transform from ghostly figures to solid beings. Miguel hesitates but is drawn to chase his dog, Dante, who plays in the glowing petals. They are welcomed by the vibrant cityscape and curious skeletons, leading to humorous exchanges about the reality of their surroundings. The scene captures a blend of wonder, humor, and familial warmth as Miguel embraces this magical experience.
Strengths
  • Visually stunning world-building
  • Creative concept of the Marigold Bridge
  • Emotional depth and character exploration
Weaknesses
  • Limited character interactions
  • Some dialogue lacks depth

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is beautifully designed, executed, and conceptually rich, setting up important plot points and character development. It effectively introduces the audience to the Land of the Dead and sets the stage for the rest of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the Marigold Bridge as a gateway to the Land of the Dead is innovative and imaginative. It introduces the audience to a unique and fantastical world while exploring themes of family, tradition, and the supernatural.

Plot: 8

The scene moves the plot forward by transitioning Miguel into the Land of the Dead and setting up key conflicts and revelations. It establishes important connections between characters and introduces new challenges for Miguel to overcome.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the afterlife with the Land of the Dead setting and the cultural elements of the Day of the Dead holiday. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and relatable.


Character Development

Characters: 7

While the focus is more on world-building and setting up the supernatural elements, the scene still allows for some character development, particularly for Miguel as he navigates this new environment and interacts with his deceased family members.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes a significant change as he transitions into the Land of the Dead and begins to confront his family's legacy and his own desires. The scene sets the stage for further character development and growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with the reality of the Land of the Dead and reconcile it with his beliefs about the afterlife. It reflects his deeper need for understanding and acceptance.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to navigate the Land of the Dead and find his deceased family member, Ernesto de la Cruz. It reflects the immediate challenge of adapting to this new environment and finding a way to return to the living world.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some tension between Miguel and his family regarding his musical aspirations, the main conflict in this scene is internal as Miguel navigates the supernatural realm of the Land of the Dead and grapples with his identity and desires.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from Miguel's internal doubts and external challenges in navigating the Land of the Dead. The uncertainty adds tension and intrigue.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as Miguel enters the Land of the Dead and begins to confront his family's expectations and his own dreams. The scene sets up important decisions and challenges that will impact the rest of the story.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing key elements of the plot, such as Miguel's connection to Ernesto de la Cruz and his journey into the Land of the Dead. It sets up important conflicts and challenges for the protagonist.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the fantastical elements and unexpected interactions between the characters and creatures in the Land of the Dead.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Miguel's skepticism about the existence of the Land of the Dead and the reality of it. It challenges his beliefs and forces him to reconsider what he thought he knew.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a sense of wonder, curiosity, and excitement as Miguel discovers the Land of the Dead and interacts with his deceased family members. There is a mix of emotions, from confusion to awe, that adds depth to the scene.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue serves mainly to convey information about the Land of the Dead and Miguel's reactions to this new world. It lacks depth in character interactions but effectively moves the scene forward.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it introduces the audience to a visually stunning and emotionally resonant world, while also setting up the protagonist's journey and challenges.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of wonder and discovery with character interactions and dialogue.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the wonder and excitement of Miguel entering the Land of the Dead, but it could benefit from deeper emotional stakes. While the visuals are enchanting, the dialogue lacks a sense of urgency or personal connection to Miguel's journey. Adding a moment where Miguel reflects on what this transition means for him personally could enhance the emotional weight.
  • The humor introduced through the dialogue about vitamins is a nice touch, but it feels slightly out of place in the context of such a significant moment. The contrast between the fantastical elements and the mundane could be more seamlessly integrated. Consider using humor that ties back to Miguel's character or his family's dynamics to maintain consistency.
  • The interactions with the skeletons, particularly the little girl and her mother, provide a humorous and light-hearted moment, but they could be expanded to further explore the cultural significance of the Day of the Dead. This would enrich the scene and provide more context for viewers unfamiliar with the traditions.
  • The transition from the cemetery to the Marigold Bridge is visually striking, but the description could be more vivid. Instead of simply stating that the bridge is glowing, consider using sensory details to describe how it feels to Miguel—what sounds he hears, how the air feels, or the scents around him. This would create a more immersive experience.
  • The scene ends rather abruptly after the family reaches the far edge of the bridge. A more defined conclusion or a moment of reflection from Miguel could provide a stronger emotional anchor. This could be a moment where he acknowledges the significance of what he is experiencing, setting the stage for the next part of his journey.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate a moment of introspection for Miguel as he steps onto the bridge, allowing him to express his thoughts or fears about what lies ahead. This could deepen the audience's connection to his character.
  • Revise the humor about vitamins to be more relevant to Miguel's character or the situation. Perhaps he could reference something more directly related to his family's beliefs or his own experiences.
  • Expand the interactions with the skeletons to include more cultural references or traditions associated with the Day of the Dead, enhancing the scene's richness and educational value.
  • Add sensory details to the description of the Marigold Bridge and the Land of the Dead to create a more immersive atmosphere. Describe the sights, sounds, and smells that Miguel experiences as he crosses the bridge.
  • Consider ending the scene with a poignant line or moment that encapsulates Miguel's feelings about his family and the journey ahead, providing a smoother transition to the next scene.



Scene 18 -  Reunion at Marigold Station
EXT. MARIGOLD GRAND CENTRAL STATION

CANNED LOOP (V.O.)
Welcome back to the Land of the
Dead. Please have all offerings
ready for re-entry. We hope you
enjoyed your holiday!

A sign reads RE-ENTRY.

ARRIVALS AGENT
Welcome back! Anything to declare?

TRAVELER
Some churros... from my family.

ARRIVALS AGENT
How wonderful! Next!

CANNED LOOP (V.O.)
...If you are experiencing travel
issues, agents at the Department of
Family Reunions are available to
assist you.

Miguel and family get into the line for RE-ENTRY, along with
other skeletons returning from the Land of the Living.



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Nearby, skeletons exit the Land of the Dead through a gate
marked DEPARTURES. Miguel watches.

DEPARTURES AGENT
Next family, please!

An ELDERLY COUPLE steps in front of a camera-mounted monitor.
The monitor scans their faces and returns an image of their
photos on an altar in the Land of the Living.

DEPARTURES AGENT (CONT'D)
Oh, your photos are on your son's
ofrenda. Have a great visit!

ELDERLY COUPLE
Gracias.

The couple unites with the rest of their family. They all
step onto the bridge, which begins to glow as they gain
footing.

CANNED LOOP (V.O.)
...And remember to return before
sunrise. Enjoy your visit!

DEPARTURES AGENT
Next!

A skeleton man, a smile full of braces, steps up to the
monitor.

DEPARTURES AGENT (CONT'D)
Your photo’s on your dentist's
ofrenda. Enjoy your visit!

JUAN ORTODONCIA
Grashiash!

DEPARTURES AGENT
Next!

HÉCTOR (early 20s), a ragged fellow, steps up to the monitor,
disguised as Frida Kahlo.

HÉCTOR
Yes, it is I. Frida Kahlo.
(beat)
Shall we skip the scanner? I'm on
so many ofrendas, it'll just
overwhelm your blinky thingie...

The monitor scans him, but an "X" appears, accompanied by a
negative buzzing sound.



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DEPARTURES AGENT
Well shoot. Looks like no one put
up your photo, Frida...

Héctor peels off his unibrow and throws off his frock.

HÉCTOR
Okay, when I said I was Frida...
just now? That... that was a lie.
And I apologize for doing that.

DEPARTURES AGENT
No photo on an ofrenda, no crossing
the bridge.

HÉCTOR
You know what, I'm just gonna zip
right over, you won't even know I'm
gone.

Héctor bolts for the bridge. A security guards blocks the
gate. Héctor splits in two and slides past the guard, half
going over, half under.

HÉCTOR
Ha HA!

Héctor reaches the bridge at a sprint, but the magic doesn't
engage; he sinks right into the petals.

HÉCTOR
Almost there, just a little
further...!

The guards saunter to the bridge and casually pull Héctor
back toward the Land of the Dead.

OFFICER
Upsy-daisy...

HÉCTOR
Fine, okay. Fine, who cares...
Dumb flower bridge!

Miguel watches as the guards haul him out. Tía Rosita looks
up in time to see his back.

TÍA ROSITA
I don't know what I'd do if no one
put up my photo.

ARRIVALS AGENT (O.S.)
Next!



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TÍA ROSITA
Oh! Come mijo, it's our turn.

The arrivals line moves forward. The Dead Riveras crowd
around the gate. The arrivals agent leans out from his
window.

ARRIVALS AGENT
Welcome back, amigos! Anything to
declare?

PAPÁ JULIO
As a matter of fact, yes.

The family pushes Miguel to the front, very much alive.

MIGUEL
Hola.

The arrivals agent's jaw literally drops.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary At Marigold Grand Central Station, skeletons return from the Land of the Living, guided by a welcoming Canned Loop voice. Miguel and his family join the line for re-entry, while an elderly couple joyfully reunites with their family after their photos are found on an ofrenda. Meanwhile, Héctor, disguised as Frida Kahlo, comically fails to cross the bridge due to lacking a photo, leading to a humorous chase with security. As tensions rise, Miguel is pushed to the front of the line, shocking the Arrivals Agent with his presence as a living person.
Strengths
  • Vibrant world-building
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Blend of humor and heartwarming moments
Weaknesses
  • Minimal conflict
  • Limited character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces the audience to the fantastical Land of the Dead, blending humor and heartwarming moments. It sets up intrigue and curiosity about the rules and customs of this world, engaging the viewers.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of re-entry from the Land of the Living into the Land of the Dead is intriguing and well-developed in this scene. It introduces unique customs and rules of the afterlife world, adding depth to the story.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene focuses on the family's return to the Land of the Dead and introduces the audience to the customs and interactions of the deceased characters. It sets up future developments and adds layers to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh concepts such as ofrendas, facial recognition monitors, and magical bridges, adding a unique twist to the familiar theme of the afterlife. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene, both living and deceased, are engaging and add depth to the story. Their interactions and reactions to the customs of the Land of the Dead provide insight into their personalities and relationships.

Character Changes: 6

There are subtle character changes in the scene, particularly in Miguel's understanding of the afterlife and his family's customs. It sets the stage for potential growth and development in future interactions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to reunite with his deceased family members and navigate the customs of the Land of the Dead. This reflects his deeper need for connection, belonging, and understanding of his heritage.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to find a way to return to the Land of the Living before sunrise. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in order to achieve his internal goal of reuniting with his family.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The conflict in the scene is minimal, focusing more on introducing the audience to the Land of the Dead and the customs of the deceased characters. It sets up potential conflicts and challenges for the future.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Héctor facing obstacles in his attempt to cross the bridge and reunite with his family. The uncertainty of the outcome adds tension and conflict to the narrative.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes in the scene are moderate, focusing more on the exploration of the Land of the Dead and the customs of the deceased characters. It sets up potential challenges and conflicts for the future.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing the audience to the Land of the Dead, setting up future developments and challenges for the characters. It adds depth and intrigue to the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8.5

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in Héctor's deception and failed attempt to cross the bridge. The audience is left wondering about the consequences of his actions.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around identity and honesty. Héctor's deception as Frida Kahlo challenges the values of truth and integrity, which relates to the protagonist's beliefs about family and authenticity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, blending humor with heartwarming moments and fantastical elements. It engages the audience and sets up emotional connections with the characters and their journey.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the humor, curiosity, and heartwarming moments of the characters. It adds to the world-building and sets the tone for future interactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its unique world-building, witty dialogue, and emotional depth. The interactions between characters and the unfolding mystery of the protagonist's journey keep the audience invested.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of dialogue, action, and visual descriptions. The rhythm builds tension and suspense, leading to a climactic moment with Héctor's failed attempt to cross the bridge.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the reader's understanding of the setting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions between characters and locations. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes the whimsical and bureaucratic nature of the Land of the Dead, using humor to contrast the serious themes of family and memory. The Canned Loop voiceover adds a comedic touch, setting the tone for the re-entry process.
  • The dialogue is light and engaging, particularly with the interactions between the arrivals agent and the travelers. The use of humor, such as the skeleton with braces and Héctor's disguise as Frida Kahlo, adds levity to the scene, making it enjoyable.
  • However, the pacing feels a bit uneven. The transitions between the arrivals and departures sections could be smoother. The scene could benefit from a more cohesive flow, perhaps by interspersing Miguel's reactions with the other travelers' interactions to maintain engagement.
  • Héctor's comedic attempt to cross the bridge is a highlight, but it could be enhanced by giving him a more defined motivation for wanting to cross. While it's clear he wants to reunite with family, a brief moment of reflection on what that means to him could deepen the emotional impact.
  • The scene introduces the concept of the ofrenda and its significance, but it could further explore the emotional weight of being forgotten. This theme is central to the story, and a stronger emphasis on the stakes involved for characters like Héctor would enhance the scene's depth.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Miguel reflects on the importance of the ofrenda and what it means to him personally, perhaps contrasting it with the humorous interactions around him.
  • To improve pacing, intersperse Miguel's reactions and thoughts throughout the arrivals and departures sections, creating a more dynamic interplay between the comedic elements and his emotional journey.
  • Enhance Héctor's motivation by including a line or two that hints at his longing for connection and the pain of being forgotten, which would resonate with the audience and add depth to his character.
  • Explore the emotional stakes of the re-entry process further, perhaps by showing a moment of tension or anxiety for Miguel as he witnesses others successfully reunite with their families, contrasting with his own situation.
  • Consider tightening the dialogue in some areas to maintain a brisk pace while ensuring that the humor remains sharp and impactful.



Scene 19 -  Family Frustrations at Marigold Station
INT. MARIGOLD GRAND CENTRAL STATION

Miguel and his family are escorted by a security guard across
an arching second floor walkway.

VOICE OVER P.A.
Paging Marta Gonzales-Ramos. Marta
Gonzales-Ramos, please report to
Level 7.

Dante happily trots alongside. Miguel looks up to see
gondolas traveling by.

MIGUEL
Whoa...

Skeletons stare at Miguel as he walks by. Suddenly Miguel
notices Tío Oscar staring at his face in deep contemplation.

TÍO OSCAR
I miss my nose...

At the end of the walkway are doors emblazoned with
"DEPARTMENT OF FAMILY REUNIONS." The family passes through.

INT. DEPARTMENT OF FAMILY REUNIONS

Inside, they find case workers helping travelers work out
holiday snafus.



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DISTRESSED TRAVELER
C'mon! Help us out amigo... We
gotta get to a dozen ofrendas
tonight...

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MIFFED WIFE
We are NOT visiting your ex-wife's
family for Día de Muertos!

CUT TO:

In a far corner, one traveler in particular is raising hell.

MAMÁ IMELDA
I demand to speak to the person in
charge!

A beleaguered CASE WORKER cringes as Mamá Imelda tears into
her.

CASE WORKER
I'm sorry, señora, it says here no
one put up your photo--

Mamá Imelda coldly eyes the Macintosh 128k on the woman's
desk.

MAMÁ IMELDA
My family always -- ALWAYS -- puts
my photo on the ofrenda! That
devil box tells you nothing but
lies!

In a swift movement, Mamá Imelda removes her shoe and smacks
the computer.

PAPÁ JULIO
Mamá Imelda?

She turns her shoe on Papá Julio, who leans back and yelps.
Mamá Imelda softens.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Oh, mi familia! They wouldn’t let
me cross the bridge! Tell this
woman and her devil box that my
photo is on the ofrenda.

PAPÁ JULIO
Well, we never made it to the
ofrenda...



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MAMÁ IMELDA
What?!

PAPÁ JULIO
We ran into... um...

Mamá Imelda's eyes fall on Miguel.

Miguel looks at Mamá Imelda. Her photo flashes before him.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel?

MIGUEL
Mamá Imelda...

MAMÁ IMELDA
What is going on?

Just then, a door opens and a CLERK pokes his head out.

CLERK
You the Rivera family?

The computer short circuits.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In the bustling Marigold Grand Central Station during Día de Muertos, Miguel and his family navigate the chaos of the Department of Family Reunions. While Tío Oscar lightens the mood with a humorous remark, Mamá Imelda's frustration escalates over her photo not being on the ofrenda, leading to a heated confrontation with a case worker. Despite Papá Julio's attempts to mediate, Mamá Imelda's anger remains unresolved as she questions Miguel, just as a clerk calls for the Rivera family, heightening the tension.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
  • Intriguing revelations
Weaknesses
  • Some predictable moments
  • Slight pacing issues

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, emotion, and intrigue, keeping the audience engaged and setting up important plot developments.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the Department of Family Reunions and the exploration of family connections in the Land of the Dead are compelling and add depth to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses effectively, with revelations about family history and conflicts arising. The scene sets up important developments for the rest of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on family dynamics and traditions, blending cultural elements with fantastical elements in a unique and authentic way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel genuine and original.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters interact well, showcasing their personalities and relationships. Miguel's family dynamics are highlighted, adding depth to their individual arcs.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel experiences a significant change in perception and understanding about his family history, leading to personal growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to navigate the complex family dynamics and traditions of Día de Muertos. He is also processing his own emotions and connections to his family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to help his family resolve their holiday snafus and reunite with their loved ones.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, particularly around misunderstandings and revelations about family connections.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing internal and external conflicts that challenge their beliefs and actions. The audience is kept on edge by the unpredictable interactions.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised as Miguel's family confronts misunderstandings and revelations about their past, impacting their relationships and future decisions.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing key information about family connections and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected interactions between characters, the clash of traditions and technology, and the emotional revelations that occur.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the importance of family traditions and honoring ancestors. Mamá Imelda's belief in the significance of her photo on the ofrenda clashes with the modern technology represented by the computer.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene elicits a range of emotions, from humor to heartwarming moments to intrigue, keeping the audience emotionally invested.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is engaging and reveals important information about the characters and their motivations. It drives the scene forward effectively.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, emotional depth, and fantastical elements. The interactions between characters and the unfolding conflicts keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension, reveals character motivations, and sets up conflicts. The rhythm of the dialogue and actions enhances the scene's effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure that effectively introduces characters, conflicts, and resolutions. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the chaotic and humorous atmosphere of the Department of Family Reunions, showcasing the challenges faced by the characters in a light-hearted manner. The dialogue is snappy and reflects the urgency of the situation, particularly with the distressed travelers and Mamá Imelda's comedic outburst.
  • Mamá Imelda's character is well-defined through her actions and dialogue, particularly her frustration with the case worker and her attachment to her photo on the ofrenda. This adds depth to her character and highlights her importance to the family dynamic.
  • The use of visual gags, such as Tío Oscar's comment about missing his nose and Mamá Imelda's shoe-smacking of the computer, adds a layer of humor that balances the emotional stakes of the scene. However, the humor could be enhanced by ensuring that the comedic moments do not overshadow the emotional weight of the family's reunion.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but it could benefit from a clearer transition between the chaos of the waiting area and the more focused interaction with Mamá Imelda. This would help maintain the audience's engagement and provide a smoother flow.
  • The introduction of the case worker and the bureaucratic elements of the Land of the Dead adds an interesting layer to the world-building. However, the scene could further explore the implications of this bureaucracy on the characters' emotional journeys, particularly Miguel's desire to connect with his family.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Miguel as he observes the chaos around him, which could deepen his emotional connection to the situation and provide insight into his thoughts and feelings about family and tradition.
  • Enhance the comedic elements by incorporating more physical comedy or visual gags that complement the dialogue, ensuring that the humor feels organic to the characters and the situation.
  • Clarify the stakes for Mamá Imelda by including a line or two that emphasizes her emotional investment in being remembered and honored by her family, which would heighten the tension in her confrontation with the case worker.
  • Introduce a moment of camaraderie among the family members as they navigate the chaos, which could serve to strengthen their bond and provide a counterbalance to Mamá Imelda's frustration.
  • Consider ending the scene with a stronger emotional hook, perhaps by having Miguel express a desire to ensure that Mamá Imelda's photo is placed on the ofrenda, reinforcing his commitment to family and tradition.



Scene 20 -  The Curse of Music
INT. CLERK'S OFFICE

CLERK
Well, you're cursed.

The family gasps.

MIGUEL
What?!

The clerk searches through a huge stack of papers.

CLERK
Día de los Muertos is a night to
GIVE to the dead. You STOLE from
the dead.

MIGUEL
But I wasn't stealing the guitar!

MAMÁ IMELDA
Guitar...?




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MIGUEL
It was my great-great
grandfather's, he would have wanted
me to have it--

MAMÁ IMELDA
Ah-ah-ah! We do not speak of
that...
(disgust)
...musician! He is DEAD to this
family!

MIGUEL
Uh, you're all dead.

Dante balances his paws at the edge of the clerk's desk and
tries to reach a plate of food.

CLERK
ACHOO! I am sorry, whose alebrije
is that?

Miguel steps up, trying to pull Dante away from the treats.

MIGUEL
That's just Dante.

TÍA ROSITA
He sure doesn't look like an
alebrije.

Tía Rosita gestures to the fantastical creatures fluttering
on the other side of the window.

TÍO OSCAR
He just looks like a plain old
dog...

TÍO FELIPE
...Or a sausage someone dropped in
a barbershop.

CLERK
Whatever he is, I am -- ACHOO! --
terribly allergic.

MIGUEL
But Dante doesn't have any hair.

CLERK
And I don't have a nose, and yet
here we are -- ACHOO!!




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MAMÁ IMELDA
But none of this explains why I
couldn't cross over.

Miguel realizes something. He sheepishly pulls out the
folded photo.

MIGUEL
Oh...

He unfolds the photo.

MAMÁ IMELDA
You took my photo off the ofrenda?!

MIGUEL
It was an accident!

Mamá Imelda turns to the clerk, fire in her eyes.

MAMÁ IMELDA
How do we send him back?!

CLERK
Well, since it's a family matter...
(flipping pages)
The way to undo a family curse is
to get your family's blessing.

MIGUEL
That's it?

CLERK
Get your family's blessing, and
everything SHOULD go back to
normal. But you gotta do it by
sunrise!

MIGUEL
What happens at sunrise?

PAPÁ JULIO
Híjole! Your hand!

Miguel looks at his hand. The tip of one of his fingers has
started to turn skeletal. He turns pale. He starts to faint
when Papá Julio picks him up and gently slaps him awake.

PAPÁ JULIO
Whoa, Miguel. Can't have you
fainting on us.




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CLERK
But not to worry! Your family's
here, you can get your blessing
right now.

The clerk searches the ground near Tía Rosita.

CLERK
Cempasúchil, cempasúchil. Aha!
Perdón, señora.

Tía Rosita titters. The clerk plucks a marigold petal from
the hem of her dress. He hands the petal to Mamá Imelda.

CLERK
(to Imelda)
Now, you look at the living and say
his name.

Imelda turns to Miguel.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel.

CLERK
Nailed it. Now say: I give you my
blessing.

MAMÁ IMELDA
I give you my blessing.

The marigold petal glows in her fingers. Miguel brightens.
But Mamá Imelda is not finished.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
I give you my blessing to go
home...

The glow of the marigold petal surges.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
To put my photo back on the
ofrenda...

Each added condition makes the petal glow brighter. Imelda
delivers it like a scolding, but Miguel nods.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
And to never play music again!

The petal surges one last time.




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MIGUEL
What? She can't do that!

CLERK
Well technically she can add any
conditions she wants.

Miguel stares her down. Imelda is firm in her resolve.

MIGUEL
Fine.

CLERK
(to Imelda)
Then you hand the petal to Miguel.

Imelda extends the petal to Miguel, who reaches for it.

He grabs the petal. WHOOOOSH! He's consumed by a whirlwind
of petals and disappears.

DE LA CRUZ'S MAUSOLEUM - NIGHT

He reappears in a whirlwind of petals. It seems like he's
solid. He runs to the window and looks out.

MIGUEL
No skeletons!

Miguel laughs, relieved. Then, a mischievous smile on his
face, he turns and eyes de la Cruz's guitar.

Miguel quickly grabs the guitar.

MIGUEL
Mariachi Plaza, here I come--

He takes two steps toward the door, then WHOOOOSH!

CLERK'S OFFICE - SAME TIME

Miguel appears back in the clerk's office in another flash of
the marigold whirlwind, without the guitar. The family
turns, shocked to see him back so soon.

Miguel realizes his hands are still in guitar-holding
position.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Two seconds and you already break
your promise!




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MIGUEL
This isn't fair, it's my life! You
already had yours!

Miguel grabs another petal, he marches over to Papá Julio.

MIGUEL
Papá Julio, I ask for your
blessing.

Papá Julio shakes his head and pulls his hat down.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Tía Rosita? Oscar? Felipe? Tía
Victoria?

They all shake their heads.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Don't make this hard, mijo. You go
home my way, or no way.

MIGUEL
You really hate music that much?

MAMÁ IMELDA
I will not let you go down the same
path he did.

Miguel gets an idea. He pulls the photo out and turns from
the group.

MIGUEL
The same path he did.

He gazes at the man with no face.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
(to himself)
He's family...

TÍA VICTORIA
Listen to your Mamá Imelda.

TÍO OSCAR
She's just looking out for you.

TÍA ROSITA
Be reasonable.

Miguel starts back toward the door.




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MIGUEL
Con permiso, I... need to visit the
restroom. Be right back!

Miguel sees himself out. The family waits for a beat.

CLERK
Uh, should we tell him there are no
restrooms in the Land of the Dead?
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In the clerk's office during Día de los Muertos, Miguel learns he is cursed for taking a guitar from the dead. His great-great-grandmother, Mamá Imelda, disapproves of music and reluctantly offers her blessing with strict conditions. As Miguel grapples with his family's disapproval and the urgency to lift the curse, he realizes he has taken Mamá Imelda's photo, preventing her from crossing over. Despite his attempts to seek support from other family members, tensions rise, leaving Miguel feeling trapped between his passion for music and his family's expectations.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Family dynamics
  • Supernatural elements
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Character motivations could be further explored

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines drama, humor, and emotion to create a compelling narrative. The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's disapproval adds depth to the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of family curses, blessings, and the conflict between pursuing one's passion and honoring family traditions is engaging and well-developed.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts and resolutions. The revelation about Mamá Imelda's father and the family curse add depth to the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the theme of family, tradition, and personal passion within the context of Día de los Muertos. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and original, adding depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene are well-defined and their motivations are clear. The conflict between Miguel and his family members is portrayed convincingly.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes a significant character change as he grapples with his passion for music and his family's expectations. The resolution of the conflict leads to personal growth for Miguel.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to gain his family's blessing so he can return to the land of the living. This reflects his deeper need for acceptance and understanding from his family, as well as his desire to pursue his passion for music.

External Goal: 7.5

Miguel's external goal is to return to the land of the living before sunrise to undo the curse that prevents him from crossing over. This goal reflects the immediate challenge he faces in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Miguel's desire to pursue music and his family's disapproval creates a high level of tension and emotional stakes.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing resistance from his family and conflicting desires within himself. The uncertainty of whether he will gain their blessing adds suspense and drama to the scene.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene as Miguel faces the choice between pursuing his passion for music and honoring his family's traditions. The resolution of the conflict has significant consequences for Miguel and his family.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, resolving the family curse, and setting up future plot developments.

Unpredictability: 7.5

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in Miguel's journey to gain his family's blessing. The shifting dynamics and conflicting desires add complexity to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the clash between tradition and personal passion. Mamá Imelda's disdain for music and her desire to control Miguel's future challenge his beliefs and values, forcing him to choose between family expectations and his own dreams.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact due to the conflict between Miguel and his family, the revelation about Mamá Imelda's father, and the resolution through the blessing.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotional tension between the characters and advances the plot. The interactions between Miguel and his family members are particularly impactful.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, emotion, and fantastical elements. The family dynamics and Miguel's internal struggle create tension and intrigue, keeping the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and invested in Miguel's journey. The rhythm of the dialogue and character interactions enhances the emotional impact of the scene.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions. The dialogue is well-paced and engaging, enhancing the overall flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively building tension and conflict while advancing the plot. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension and conflict by introducing the concept of a curse and the stakes involved for Miguel. The dialogue is snappy and captures the urgency of the situation, particularly with Miguel's frantic attempts to explain himself and the family's reactions to the curse.
  • The humor interspersed throughout the scene, particularly with the clerk's allergies and the playful banter about Dante, adds levity to an otherwise serious situation. This balance of humor and tension is well-executed and keeps the audience engaged.
  • Mamá Imelda's character is well-defined through her strong reactions and her insistence on the family's traditions. Her conflict with Miguel is palpable, and her conditions for the blessing create a compelling dilemma for him.
  • The stakes are clearly established with the ticking clock of needing to obtain the blessing by sunrise, which adds urgency to Miguel's quest. However, the scene could benefit from a clearer emotional arc for Miguel, as he transitions from panic to determination.
  • The scene ends on a cliffhanger with Miguel's decision to seek blessings from other family members, which effectively propels the narrative forward. However, the transition to the next scene could be smoother to maintain the momentum.
Suggestions
  • Consider deepening Miguel's emotional response to the curse and the implications of his family's disapproval. This could involve a moment of reflection or a flashback that highlights his passion for music and the sacrifices he's willing to make.
  • Enhance the visual elements of the scene by incorporating more vivid descriptions of the clerk's office and the fantastical elements of the Land of the Dead. This could help ground the audience in the setting and make the stakes feel more immediate.
  • Explore the dynamics between Miguel and his family members further. Perhaps include a moment where a family member expresses a hidden desire for music, creating a more complex family dynamic and adding layers to the conflict.
  • To improve the pacing, consider tightening some of the dialogue exchanges, particularly the humorous ones, to maintain the urgency of the scene while still delivering laughs.
  • Ensure that the transition from this scene to the next is seamless. You might want to include a visual cue or a line of dialogue that hints at Miguel's next steps, making the flow of the story feel more cohesive.



Scene 21 -  A Narrow Escape
INT. STAIRCASE - MOMENTS LATER

Miguel hustles down a staircase with Dante. Once on the
ground floor, they huddle beneath the staircase. He looks to
the upper floor. The Dead Riveras are there. Tío Oscar asks
a PATROLWOMAN about a boy of Miguel's height. The
patrolwoman picks up her walkie-talkie.

Miguel scopes the ground floor and spies a revolving door
exit.

MIGUEL
Vámonos.

Miguel puts up his hood, tightening it to a tiny eye hole,
and heads out. Dante pads after him.

PATROLWOMAN
We got a family looking for a
LIVING BOY.

MIGUEL
If I wanna be a musician, I need a
MUSICIAN'S blessing. We gotta find
my great-great grandpa.

The exit gets closer when Miguel is stopped by a PATROLMAN.

PATROLMAN
Hold it, muchacho.

Miguel's hoodie loosens to reveal his living face.

PATROLMAN
Ahh!

The patrolman frantically grabs for his walkie-talkie.

PATROLMAN
I've found that living boy!




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A large family passes between Miguel and the officer, chatty,
arms full of offerings.

PATROLMAN
Uh whoa, excuse me, excuse me
folks! Excuse me--

Once the family clears, Miguel is nowhere to be seen.

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a tense moment in the Land of the Dead, Miguel and Dante hide beneath a staircase as Tío Oscar and a patrolwoman search for him. Spotting a revolving door exit, Miguel decides to flee to find his great-great-grandfather for a musician's blessing. Just as a patrolman identifies Miguel, a large family passes by, providing the distraction needed for Miguel to escape unnoticed.
Strengths
  • Engaging plot progression
  • Strong character development
  • Tension-building
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Certain character motivations could be further explored

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds tension, introduces high stakes, and sets up a crucial turning point in the story with Miguel's decision to seek his great-great-grandfather's blessing.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel defying his family's traditions to pursue his dream of music is engaging and drives the plot forward, setting up important character development.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with Miguel's escape marking a crucial turning point in his journey and setting up key conflicts and resolutions.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family, tradition, and pursuing one's dreams, with a unique setting and cultural elements. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and resonate with the audience.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Miguel, Abuelita, and the patrolman, are well-developed and their interactions add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant development in this scene, asserting his independence and determination to pursue his dreams despite the consequences.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to find his great-great grandpa and receive his blessing to pursue his dream of becoming a musician. This reflects his deeper desire for validation and acceptance of his passion for music.

External Goal: 7.5

Miguel's external goal is to evade the patrol officers and reach his great-great grandpa without being caught. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Miguel and his family, as well as the external conflict of his escape, creates high tension and propels the narrative forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing obstacles and challenges that test his determination and resourcefulness, adding tension and conflict to the narrative.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, as Miguel risks alienating his family, facing a curse, and embarking on a dangerous quest to obtain his great-great-grandfather's blessing.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up important plot developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in Miguel's escape from the patrol officers, keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between the living and the dead, as well as the pursuit of dreams and family expectations. Miguel's desire to follow his passion clashes with the expectations of his family and the rules of the Land of the Dead.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from excitement to tension to defiance, drawing the audience into Miguel's journey and struggles.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys Miguel's determination, the family's disapproval, and the tension in the scene, but could be more impactful in certain moments.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of action, emotion, and thematic depth, keeping the audience invested in Miguel's journey and the outcome of his quest.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and suspenseful moments that maintain the audience's interest and drive the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear and concise descriptions, dialogue, and scene transitions.

Structure: 8.5

The scene follows a well-paced and engaging structure, building tension and suspense effectively while advancing the plot and character development.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension as Miguel tries to evade capture, which is crucial for maintaining the narrative momentum. However, the stakes could be heightened further by emphasizing the urgency of Miguel's quest for his great-great-grandfather's blessing. Adding internal dialogue or a brief flashback could illustrate why this blessing is so vital to him, deepening the audience's emotional investment.
  • The dialogue is functional but could benefit from more character-specific language. For instance, Miguel's line about needing a musician's blessing feels a bit flat. Infusing it with more of his personality or desperation could make it resonate more with the audience. Consider how Miguel's passion for music could be reflected in his words.
  • The patrolman's reaction to Miguel's living face is a strong moment, but it could be enhanced by showing more of Miguel's fear or panic in that instant. This would create a more visceral connection to his predicament. Additionally, the patrolman's frantic behavior could be played for more comedic effect, given the absurdity of the situation.
  • The use of the family passing by as a distraction is clever, but it feels somewhat convenient. It might be more engaging to show Miguel using his wits to create this distraction himself, showcasing his resourcefulness and determination. This would also reinforce his character traits and make the escape feel earned rather than coincidental.
  • The scene ends abruptly after the patrolman realizes Miguel is missing. While this creates a cliffhanger, it might benefit from a brief moment of reflection from Miguel after he escapes. This could serve to highlight his relief and the gravity of his situation, allowing the audience to catch their breath before moving on.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate internal monologue or flashbacks to deepen Miguel's motivation for seeking his great-great-grandfather's blessing, enhancing emotional stakes.
  • Revise Miguel's dialogue to reflect his personality and passion for music, making it more engaging and relatable.
  • Add more physicality to Miguel's reaction when discovered by the patrolman, emphasizing his fear and the absurdity of the situation for comedic effect.
  • Consider having Miguel create the distraction himself instead of relying on the family passing by, showcasing his cleverness and determination.
  • Include a moment of reflection for Miguel after his escape to emphasize the gravity of his situation and allow the audience to process the tension.



Scene 22 -  Desperate Negotiations
INT. NEARBY CORRIDOR

Miguel and Dante hide from the patrolman. But Dante wanders
off to inspect a side room.

MIGUEL
No, no -- Dante!

INT. DEPARTMENT OF CORRECTIONS

Miguel catches up to Dante. He overhears an exchange in a
nearby cubicle.

CORRECTIONS OFFICER
...disturbing the peace, fleeing an
officer, falsifying a unibrow...

HÉCTOR
That's illegal?

CORRECTIONS OFFICER
VERY illegal. You need to clean up
your act, amigo.

HÉCTOR
Amigo?
(verklempt)
Oh, that's so nice, to hear you say
that, because...
(misty)
I've just had a really hard Día de
Muertos, and I could really use an
amigo right now.

Héctor leans gratefully toward the officer, overwhelmed with
mock emotion.




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HÉCTOR (CONT’D)
And amigos, they help their amigos.
Listen, you get me across that
bridge tonight and I'll make it
worth your while.

Héctor spies a de la Cruz poster at the officer's
workstation.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
Oh, you like de la Cruz? He and I
go way back! I can get you front
row seats to his Sunrise
Spectacular Show!

Miguel perks at the mention of de la Cruz.

CORRECTIONS OFFICER
Uh--

HÉCTOR
I'll -- I'll get you backstage, you
can meet him!
(beat)
You just gotta let me cross that
bridge!

The corrections officer pulls away.

CORRECTIONS OFFICER
I should lock you up for the rest
of the holiday...
(beat)
But my shift's almost up, and I
wanna visit my living family... so
I'm letting you off with a warning.

HÉCTOR
Can I at least get my costume back?

CORRECTIONS OFFICER
Uh, no.

In a huff, Héctor marches out of the room.

HÉCTOR
Some amigo...

Miguel follows him.




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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a tense yet humorous scene, Miguel follows his curious dog Dante into a department of corrections, where he overhears Héctor attempting to negotiate his release with a corrections officer. Héctor offers backstage access to a famous musician, but the officer ultimately dismisses him with just a warning, keeping Héctor's costume and leaving him feeling betrayed. The scene captures the contrast between Héctor's flamboyant personality and the officer's stern demeanor, ending with Héctor's frustrated departure as Miguel follows him.
Strengths
  • Blend of humor, emotion, and fantasy elements
  • Strong character development
  • High stakes and emotional conflict
Weaknesses
  • Minor issues with transitions
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, emotion, and fantasy elements to create a compelling narrative. The high stakes and emotional conflict add depth to the story, while the humor keeps the tone light and engaging.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the scene, focusing on crossing bridges between the living and the dead, is innovative and well-executed. The blending of humor, emotion, and fantasy elements adds depth to the narrative.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging, with high stakes and emotional conflict driving the story forward. The revelation of the curse and the quest for Miguel's family's blessing add tension and depth to the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on a familiar situation by incorporating elements of Día de Muertos and a comedic twist on a serious encounter. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene are well-developed, with clear motivations and conflicts. Miguel's determination, Héctor's humor, and Mamá Imelda's strictness create dynamic interactions that drive the plot forward.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes a significant change in the scene, from defiance to acceptance of his family's expectations. The emotional journey he goes through adds depth to his character.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal is to find a way to cross the bridge and attend de la Cruz's show. This reflects his desire to reconnect with his past and fulfill his dreams.

External Goal: 7

Héctor's external goal is to convince the corrections officer to let him cross the bridge and attend de la Cruz's show.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is high, with Miguel facing the consequences of his actions and the tension between his passion for music and his family's disapproval. The emotional conflict drives the plot forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and uncertainty, as the audience is unsure of the officer's decision.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are high, with Miguel facing the consequences of his actions, the curse, and the need to obtain his family's blessing. The urgency adds tension and drives the plot forward.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward, with the revelation of the curse, Miguel's quest for his family's blessing, and the high stakes driving the narrative towards a resolution.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected turn of events, such as the officer's decision to let Héctor off with a warning.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between following the rules and taking risks to pursue one's dreams. Héctor challenges the officer's authority and the officer must decide between enforcing the law or showing compassion.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, with moments of humor, desperation, and hope resonating with the audience. The conflict and stakes add depth to the emotional resonance of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the characters' emotions and motivations. The humor adds lightness to the narrative, while the emotional moments resonate with the audience.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic interactions between the characters, the humor infused in the dialogue, and the high stakes of Héctor's goal.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene builds tension effectively and keeps the audience engaged in Héctor's journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene headings and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a buildup of tension and a resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively uses humor to lighten the tension of Miguel's situation, particularly through Héctor's interactions with the corrections officer. This contrast between the serious stakes of Miguel's quest and the comedic elements of Héctor's predicament adds depth to the narrative.
  • Héctor's character is well-developed in this scene, showcasing his desperation and charm. His attempts to negotiate with the corrections officer reveal his resourcefulness and willingness to leverage his connections, which adds layers to his character.
  • The dialogue flows naturally, with Héctor's emotional appeal to the corrections officer feeling genuine despite the comedic context. However, the humor could be enhanced by tightening the pacing of the dialogue exchanges to maintain a brisk rhythm that matches the urgency of Miguel's situation.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the setting. While the dialogue is engaging, adding specific details about the environment—such as the cluttered office or the expressions on the characters' faces—would create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • The transition from Miguel hiding to overhearing the conversation is somewhat abrupt. A brief moment of tension or a visual cue indicating Miguel's anxiety about being discovered could heighten the stakes and make the audience more invested in his plight.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel's heart races as he hears the patrolman approaching, which would heighten the tension and make the audience more anxious about his discovery.
  • Incorporate more physical comedy or visual gags during Héctor's negotiation with the corrections officer to enhance the humor and keep the audience engaged.
  • Include a brief description of the corrections officer's demeanor—whether he is stern, amused, or sympathetic—to provide more context for his interactions with Héctor.
  • Explore the emotional weight of Héctor's situation further by having him reflect on his past or express a deeper longing for connection, which could resonate with the audience and add depth to his character.
  • Consider ending the scene with a stronger hook that propels Miguel into the next action, such as a sudden noise that alerts the patrolman, prompting Miguel to make a quick decision.



Scene 23 -  A Desperate Alliance
INT. HALLWAY

MIGUEL
Hey. Hey! You really know de la
Cruz?

HÉCTOR
Who wants to--
(noticing Miguel)
Ah! You're alive!

MIGUEL
Shhh!

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INT. PHONEBOOTH

Miguel pulls Héctor into a phone booth to avoid suspicion.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Yeah I'm alive. And if I wanna get
back to the Land of the Living, I
need de la Cruz's blessing.

HÉCTOR
That's weirdly specific.

MIGUEL
He's my great-great-grandfather.

HÉCTOR
He's your wha-whaat...?

Hector's eyes drop into his mouth. He pops them back up with
a punch to his jaw. Miguel is a little grossed out.

Héctor turns to conference with himself.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
Wait, wait, wait, wait, wait.
Wait, wait...
(gasp)
Wait, no, wait, wait, wait. Wait,
wait, wait, wait, wait, wait?
(beat)
Yes! You're going back to the Land
of the Living?!

MIGUEL
D'ya know what, maybe this isn't
such a g--




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Héctor snaps his fingers rapidly, pistons firing.

HÉCTOR
No, niño, niño, niño, I can help
you! You can help me. We can help
each other! But most importantly,
you can help ME.

Miguel suddenly spies his family hurrying down a staircase.
Mamá Imelda spots Miguel.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel!

MIGUEL
AH!

Héctor extends his hand.

HÉCTOR
I'm Héctor.

MIGUEL
That's nice!

Miguel grabs Héctor by the wrist and drags him to the exit,
away from his family.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Adventure"]

Summary In a hallway of the Land of the Dead, Miguel reveals to Héctor that he needs the blessing of his great-great-grandfather, de la Cruz, to return to the Land of the Living. Initially shocked, Héctor quickly becomes eager to help Miguel, suggesting they can assist each other. As Miguel's family approaches, he urgently drags Héctor away to avoid being seen, marking the start of their partnership amidst a mix of urgency and humor.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Potential confusion for viewers unfamiliar with the story's mythology
  • Some elements may feel rushed or underdeveloped

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, suspense, and emotional depth, keeping the audience engaged and invested in Miguel's journey. The revelation of Miguel's great-great-grandfather's identity adds a new layer of complexity to the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel seeking his great-great-grandfather's blessing to lift a curse is intriguing and drives the plot forward. The scene introduces new elements that deepen the story's mythology.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and propels the story forward by revealing important information about Miguel's family history and the curse he must overcome. The conflict between Miguel, Mamá Imelda, and Héctor adds tension and raises the stakes.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the afterlife and family dynamics, blending humor and heart in a unique way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging, adding to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene, particularly Miguel, Héctor, and Mamá Imelda, are well-developed and their motivations are clear. The interactions between the characters drive the narrative and reveal new layers of their personalities.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant character development in the scene as he learns about his family history and grapples with the choice between his passion for music and his family's expectations. The revelation of his connection to de la Cruz marks a turning point in his journey.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to seek de la Cruz's blessing to return to the Land of the Living. This reflects his deeper need for validation, connection to his family, and a desire to pursue his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to avoid being caught by his family and to enlist Héctor's help in getting de la Cruz's blessing. This reflects the immediate challenge of navigating the Land of the Dead and achieving his ultimate goal of returning to the Land of the Living.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is high, with Miguel facing opposition from his family, the curse he must lift, and the pressure to make a difficult choice between his dreams and his family's expectations.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing obstacles from his family, Héctor's reluctance to help, and the looming threat of being caught. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how Miguel will overcome these challenges.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes in the scene are high, with Miguel facing the challenge of lifting a curse, reconciling with his family, and pursuing his passion for music. The consequences of his choices have far-reaching implications for his future.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing important information about Miguel's family history, the curse he must lift, and the obstacles he faces in pursuing his dreams. The introduction of Héctor and the revelation of Miguel's connection to de la Cruz set the stage for future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' actions and dialogue. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Miguel's desire for independence and pursuit of his dreams, and his family's expectations and traditions. This challenges Miguel's beliefs about following his passion and staying true to himself while respecting his family's wishes.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, with moments of humor, suspense, and heartwarming interactions between the characters. Miguel's journey to seek his great-great-grandfather's blessing is emotionally resonant and drives the audience's investment in his story.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is engaging and reveals important information about the characters and their relationships. The banter between Miguel and Héctor adds humor, while the emotional exchanges between Miguel and Mamá Imelda deepen the emotional impact of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced action, witty dialogue, and emotional stakes. The audience is drawn into Miguel's journey and invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing action, dialogue, and character development. The rhythm keeps the audience engaged and builds tension effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions and action lines are concise and effective.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness and keep the audience engaged.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes a sense of urgency and humor, particularly through the interactions between Miguel and Héctor. The dialogue is snappy and captures the chaotic energy of the moment, which is essential for maintaining the audience's engagement.
  • Héctor's exaggerated reactions, such as his eyes dropping into his mouth, add a comedic element that contrasts well with the tension of Miguel needing to escape his family. However, this physical comedy could be enhanced with more visual cues or actions that further emphasize the absurdity of the situation.
  • The use of the phone booth as a hiding place is a clever visual metaphor for Miguel's desire to connect with the living world while being trapped in the Land of the Dead. However, the transition into the phone booth could be more dynamic, perhaps with a brief moment of hesitation or a comedic struggle to fit both characters inside.
  • Mamá Imelda's sudden appearance adds a layer of tension, but the scene could benefit from a stronger build-up to her entrance. A brief moment where Miguel senses her presence before she calls out could heighten the stakes and create a more dramatic reveal.
  • The dialogue between Miguel and Héctor is engaging, but it could be more concise in places. For instance, Héctor's repeated 'wait' could be trimmed to maintain the scene's pacing. Additionally, Miguel's line about de la Cruz being his great-great-grandfather could be more impactful if it were delivered with more emotional weight, emphasizing Miguel's desperation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of physical comedy as Miguel and Héctor enter the phone booth, such as them awkwardly bumping into each other or struggling to fit inside, to enhance the humor.
  • Strengthen the build-up to Mamá Imelda's entrance by including a moment where Miguel senses her approach, creating a more dramatic tension before she calls out his name.
  • Trim down some of the repetitive dialogue, particularly in Héctor's lines, to keep the pacing brisk and maintain the audience's engagement.
  • Emphasize Miguel's emotional stakes when he reveals his connection to de la Cruz. This could be done through a more heartfelt delivery or a brief flashback that highlights his longing to connect with his family through music.
  • Consider incorporating more visual gags or reactions from Héctor that play off the absurdity of the situation, enhancing the comedic tone while keeping the urgency intact.



Scene 24 -  The Search Begins
EXT. MARIGOLD GRAND CENTRAL STATION

Miguel and Dante burst out the door and rush down the stairs.
Héctor's arm snaps to get Miguel’s attention. Miguel
realizes it’s no longer attached to Héctor’s body. The arm
signals backwards to Héctor who is ten paces behind.

HÉCTOR
Espérame chamaco!

Miguel throws the arm back to Héctor an they disappear into a
dense crowd.

Moments later, the Dead Riveras burst from the revolving
doors. Mamá Imelda scours the crowd for Miguel. He's
nowhere to be found.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Ay, he is going to get himself
killed... I need my spirit guide,
Pepita.

Mamá Imelda looks to the night sky, puts two fingers to her
mouth, and lets out a piercing whistle.



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FWOOOMP! A giant winged jaguar lands in front of Mamá
Imelda. She turns to the family.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Who has that petal Miguel touched?

PAPÁ JULIO
Here!

Papá Julio steps forward with a marigold petal. He creeps
forward, jittery, holding it out for Pepita.

PAPÁ JULIO
Nice alebrije...

Pepita sniffs the petal’s scent.

Suddenly Pepita's head darts, narrowing in on the scent. She
takes to the air.
Genres: ["Fantasy","Adventure","Family"]

Summary As Miguel and Dante escape Marigold Grand Central Station, Héctor's disembodied arm guides them through the crowd. Meanwhile, Mamá Imelda, frantic with worry, calls for her spirit guide, Pepita, to help find Miguel. With the assistance of Papá Julio, who presents a marigold petal touched by Miguel, Pepita takes flight, following Miguel's scent into the night, marking the start of a desperate search.
Strengths
  • Strong concept and execution
  • Emotional depth and character development
  • Blend of fantasy and family dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Pacing in certain moments

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends fantasy elements with emotional family dynamics, creating tension and excitement while advancing the plot.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of seeking a family blessing to lift a curse is compelling and drives the narrative forward with high stakes and emotional depth.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene as Miguel embarks on a quest to seek his family's blessing, leading to character growth and conflict.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique supernatural elements like spirit guides and alebrijes, adding a fresh and imaginative twist to the familiar theme of family and tradition. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with clear motivations and emotional arcs that drive the scene forward.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant character growth as he confronts his family's disapproval and seeks their blessing, leading to a shift in his perspective and goals.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to find his way back to the Land of the Living and reunite with his family. This reflects his deeper desire for acceptance and understanding of his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to avoid being caught by the Dead Riveras and return to the Land of the Living before it's too late.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Miguel and his family, as well as the urgency of lifting the curse, creates high stakes and tension throughout the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create tension and uncertainty about Miguel's fate, adding suspense and complexity to the narrative.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of lifting a curse, seeking family approval, and navigating the Land of the Dead add tension and urgency to the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by introducing new challenges, deepening character relationships, and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected appearance of Pepita, the supernatural events, and the characters' unpredictable actions that keep the audience on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the importance of family and tradition versus personal dreams and aspirations. This challenges Miguel's beliefs about following his passion for music while respecting his family's wishes.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, blending anxiety, hope, and determination in the characters' actions and interactions.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension, humor, and emotional depth of the scene, though some moments could be more impactful.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced action, witty dialogue, and supernatural elements that keep the audience intrigued and invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing action, dialogue, and emotional beats to maintain tension and keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting that enhance readability and flow.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear progression of events and character interactions that build tension and advance the plot.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the urgency of Miguel and Héctor's escape, utilizing visual humor with the disembodied arm. This adds a whimsical element that contrasts with the tension of the situation, making it engaging for the audience.
  • Mamá Imelda's concern for Miguel is palpable, and her character's protective nature is well-established through her dialogue and actions. However, the emotional stakes could be heightened by including a brief flashback or a line that hints at her past experiences with loss, which would deepen her motivation.
  • The introduction of Pepita, the spirit guide, is visually striking and adds a fantastical element to the scene. However, the transition from the crowd to the summoning of Pepita feels slightly abrupt. A moment of hesitation or a brief internal conflict for Mamá Imelda could enhance the flow and build anticipation for Pepita's arrival.
  • The dialogue is functional but could benefit from more subtext or emotional weight. For instance, instead of simply stating that Miguel is going to get himself killed, Mamá Imelda could express a specific fear or memory that relates to her past, making her concern more relatable and impactful.
  • The scene's pacing is generally good, but the moment where Pepita takes to the air could be expanded to allow for a more dramatic buildup. A brief pause or a moment of silence before her flight could amplify the tension and excitement.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two of internal dialogue for Mamá Imelda that reflects her fears or past experiences with loss, which would provide depth to her character and enhance the emotional stakes.
  • Introduce a moment of hesitation for Mamá Imelda before she summons Pepita, perhaps reflecting on the gravity of the situation or her own fears, to create a smoother transition and build anticipation.
  • Expand the moment when Pepita takes to the air by incorporating a brief pause or silence, allowing the audience to absorb the significance of her action and heightening the dramatic effect.
  • Revise Mamá Imelda's dialogue to include more emotional subtext, perhaps referencing a specific past event that informs her current fears, making her concern for Miguel more relatable.
  • Consider using visual cues or sound effects to enhance the moment when Pepita arrives, such as a dramatic score or a change in lighting, to emphasize the magical realism of the scene.



Scene 25 -  A Pact in the Shadows
EXT. UNDERPASS TUNNEL - NIGHT

Miguel sits on a wooden crate. Héctor uses his thumb to
smudge black and white shoe polish on the boy’s face.

HÉCTOR
Hey, hey, hold still.
(beat)
Look up. Look up. A ver, a ver...
look up. Up, UP!... Ta-da!

Héctor opens a small mirror. Miguel's face is painted to
look like a skeleton.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
Dead as a doorknob.
(beat)
So listen, Miguel: this place runs
on memories. When you're well-
remembered, people put up your
photo and you get to cross the
bridge and visit the living on Día
de Muertos.
(beat)
Unless you're me.

MIGUEL
You don't get to cross over.




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HÉCTOR
No one's ever put up my picture...
(beat)
But you can change that!

He unfolds an old picture. In it is a young, living Héctor.

MIGUEL
This is you?

HÉCTOR
Muy guapo, eh?

MIGUEL
So you get me to my great-great
grandpa, then I put up your photo
when I get home?

HÉCTOR
Such a smart boy! Yes! Great
idea, yes!
(beat)
One hiccup: de la Cruz is a tough
guy to get to. And I need to cross
that bridge soon. Like TONIGHT.
(upbeat)
So, you got any other family here,
you know? Someone a bit more...
accessible?

MIGUEL
Mmm, nope.

HÉCTOR
Don't yank my chain, chamaco. You
gotta have SOME other family.

MIGUEL
ONLY de la Cruz. If you can't help
me, I'll find him myself.

Miguel marches out of the alley, whistling for Dante to
follow.

HÉCTOR
Okay, okay, kid, fine -- fine!
I'll get you to your great-great
grandpa...!

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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Adventure"]

Summary In a dark underpass, Miguel sits on a crate as Héctor paints his face with shoe polish to resemble a skeleton. Héctor shares the significance of memories in the afterlife, revealing his inability to cross over due to the absence of his photo. He explains that Miguel must help him find his great-great-grandfather, de la Cruz, to get his picture displayed. Despite Héctor's pleas to consider his family, Miguel remains focused on his goal. The scene culminates in Miguel's determination to find de la Cruz, leading Héctor to reluctantly agree to assist him.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Potential lack of clarity on the consequences of the characters' actions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted, with a good balance of humor, emotion, and plot progression. It effectively sets up the next stage of the story while developing the relationship between Miguel and Héctor.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of memories and remembrance driving the afterlife in the Land of the Dead is a unique and compelling idea. The scene effectively introduces this concept and its importance to the characters.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses significantly in this scene, as Miguel and Héctor form an alliance to achieve their goals. The introduction of the quest to find de la Cruz adds depth to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the afterlife and the concept of memory as a way to cross over. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and original, adding depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters of Miguel and Héctor are well-developed in this scene, with their motivations and personalities coming through clearly. Their dynamic and evolving relationship drives the scene forward.

Character Changes: 7

Both Miguel and Héctor undergo some character development in this scene, as they form an unlikely alliance and begin to work towards a common goal.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to find a way to help Héctor cross over to the land of the living by putting up his photo on the bridge. This reflects Miguel's desire to help others and his willingness to go to great lengths to achieve his goals.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to find a way to reach his great-great-grandfather, de la Cruz, in order to fulfill his dream of becoming a musician. This goal reflects the immediate challenge Miguel is facing in the afterlife.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily stemming from the characters' differing goals and the obstacles they face in achieving them.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and challenge the protagonist's goals, but not overwhelming to the point of discouraging the audience. The obstacles faced by the characters add depth and tension to the scene.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, as Miguel and Héctor must work together to achieve their goals and overcome the challenges they face in the Land of the Dead.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing the quest to find de la Cruz and setting up the next stage of the characters' journey in the Land of the Dead.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the characters' motivations and actions. The audience is left unsure of how the protagonist will achieve his goals, adding tension and intrigue to the scene.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of memory and remembrance as a way to cross over to the afterlife. It challenges Miguel's beliefs about the importance of family and the power of memory.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, particularly in the interactions between Miguel and Héctor as they bond over their shared goals and struggles.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is engaging and serves to move the plot forward while revealing important information about the characters. The banter between Miguel and Héctor adds humor and depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic interactions between the characters, the high stakes of the protagonist's goals, and the emotional depth of the dialogue. The humor and suspense keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of tension, humor, and emotion. The rhythm of the dialogue and action keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. It enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes the relationship between Miguel and Héctor, showcasing their dynamic through playful banter and the urgency of their situation. However, the dialogue could benefit from more emotional depth to enhance the stakes of their quest. While the humor is present, the underlying desperation of Héctor's situation could be emphasized further to create a stronger emotional connection with the audience.
  • Héctor's explanation about memories and the importance of being remembered is a crucial plot point, but it feels somewhat rushed. Expanding on this concept could provide more context for Miguel's motivations and the stakes involved in their journey. This would also allow for a deeper exploration of Héctor's character and his longing for connection.
  • The visual element of Héctor painting Miguel's face is a strong image that symbolizes transformation and the blending of their worlds. However, the scene could benefit from more descriptive language to enhance the visual storytelling. For instance, describing the setting of the underpass tunnel in more detail could create a more immersive atmosphere.
  • The pacing of the scene feels a bit uneven. The transition from the playful face painting to the serious discussion about family and memories could be smoother. Consider adding a moment of reflection or a pause after the face painting to allow the weight of their conversation to settle in.
  • The dialogue between Miguel and Héctor is engaging, but it could be more varied in tone. Currently, it oscillates between humor and seriousness, which can be jarring. Finding a balance that allows for moments of levity while still addressing the gravity of their situation would enhance the overall flow of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel reflects on his own family and the importance of memories, which would parallel Héctor's situation and deepen their connection.
  • Expand on Héctor's backstory and his feelings about being forgotten. This could be done through a brief flashback or a more detailed description of the photo he shows Miguel.
  • Enhance the visual description of the underpass tunnel to create a more vivid setting. Include sensory details such as sounds, smells, and the atmosphere to draw the audience into the scene.
  • Smooth out the pacing by inserting a brief pause or a moment of silence after the face painting, allowing the weight of their conversation to resonate before moving on.
  • Introduce a moment of vulnerability for Héctor, perhaps by having him share a specific memory or a longing related to his family, which would add emotional depth to his character.



Scene 26 -  A Skeleton's Promise
EXT. BUSTLING STREET

They make their way through a pedestrian path.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
...It's not gonna be easy, you
know? He's a busy man.
(beat)
What are you doing?

Miguel slink-walks next to Héctor goofily.

MIGUEL
I'm walking like a skeleton.
Blending in.

HÉCTOR
No, skeletons don't walk like that.

MIGUEL
It's how you walk.

HÉCTOR
No, I don't.

Miguel keeps walking funny.

HÉCTOR (CONT’D)
Stop it!

Miguel notices a billboard advertising "ERNESTO DE LA CRUZ'S
SUNRISE SPECTACULAR!;" "Remember Me" blares from attached
speakers.

MIGUEL
Whoa..."Ernesto de la Cruz's
Sunrise Spectacular...!” Qué
padre!

HÉCTOR
Blech. Every year, your great-
great grandpa puts on that dumb
show to mark the end of Día de
Muertos.

MIGUEL
And you can get us in!

HÉCTOR
Ahhhh--




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MIGUEL
Hey, you said you had front row
tickets!

HÉCTOR
That... that was a lie. I
apologize for that.

Miguel gives Héctor a withering look.

HÉCTOR
Cool off, chamaco, come on... I'll
get you to him.

MIGUEL
How?

HÉCTOR
'Cause I happen to know where he's
rehearsing!

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Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Family"]

Summary In a lively Día de Muertos street, Miguel and Héctor discuss the challenges of meeting the famous Ernesto de la Cruz. Miguel tries to walk like a skeleton, amusing Héctor, who teases him about it. They spot a billboard for Ernesto's show, igniting Miguel's excitement, while Héctor dismisses it as trivial. Miguel reminds Héctor of his promise for front row tickets, leading to a humorous revelation that Héctor lied. Despite this, Héctor reassures Miguel that he knows where Ernesto is rehearsing, setting the stage for their next adventure.
Strengths
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Clear plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Limited intense conflict
  • Some predictable elements

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, character development, and plot progression, setting up the next stage of the story while maintaining an engaging tone.


Story Content

Concept: 7

The concept of Miguel seeking out his great-great-grandfather, de la Cruz, with the help of Héctor adds intrigue and sets up potential conflicts and resolutions. The idea of using a rehearsal as a ruse is clever.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses smoothly as Miguel and Héctor plan to attend de la Cruz's rehearsal, introducing new obstacles and goals for the characters. The scene sets up future developments effectively.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on the mentor-mentee dynamic with Miguel and Hector's relationship. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Miguel and Héctor are well-developed in this scene, with their personalities and motivations coming through clearly. Their dynamic adds depth and humor to the story.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel's determination and resourcefulness are highlighted in this scene, showing his growth and willingness to take risks to achieve his goals. Héctor's willingness to help also showcases his character development.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to connect with his idol, Ernesto de la Cruz, and prove his talent as a musician. This reflects his deeper desire for recognition and acceptance of his passion for music.

External Goal: 7.5

Miguel's external goal is to gain access to Ernesto de la Cruz's show and meet him in person. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in getting closer to his musical idol.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some conflict in terms of Miguel's quest and the obstacles he faces, the scene is more focused on humor and character interaction than intense conflict.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene comes from Hector's reluctance to help Miguel and the obstacles they face in reaching Ernesto de la Cruz, creating tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 6

While there are stakes involved in Miguel's quest to lift the curse and obtain his family's blessing, the scene maintains a lighter tone focused on humor and character dynamics.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by setting up the next stage of Miguel's journey to find de la Cruz and obtain his family's blessing. It introduces new challenges and goals for the characters.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in Miguel and Hector's plans, adding tension and intrigue to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between tradition and modernity evident in the scene. Miguel's admiration for Ernesto de la Cruz's show clashes with Hector's disdain for the event, highlighting different perspectives on cultural celebrations.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits emotions of excitement, curiosity, and disappointment as Miguel and Héctor navigate the bustling street and plan their next steps. The humor adds a light-hearted touch.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is engaging, humorous, and reveals important information about the characters and their goals. The banter between Miguel and Héctor adds to the scene's charm.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic between Miguel and Hector, the humor in their interactions, and the anticipation of Miguel meeting his idol.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene keeps the audience engaged with a good balance of dialogue and action, moving the story forward effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene descriptions and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character interactions and progression of the plot.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the playful dynamic between Miguel and Héctor, showcasing their budding partnership. However, the humor could be enhanced by incorporating more physical comedy or exaggerated reactions, especially from Héctor, to emphasize the absurdity of Miguel's attempts to walk like a skeleton.
  • The dialogue flows well, but there are moments where it feels a bit repetitive, particularly in the back-and-forth about how skeletons walk. This could be streamlined to maintain the comedic rhythm without losing the essence of their playful banter.
  • The introduction of the billboard advertising 'Ernesto de la Cruz's Sunrise Spectacular' serves as a strong visual cue that propels the narrative forward. However, it might benefit from a more vivid description to evoke a stronger sense of excitement and spectacle, perhaps by detailing the colors, sounds, or atmosphere surrounding the billboard.
  • Héctor's initial reluctance to help Miguel could be more pronounced to build tension. By showing more of his internal conflict or hesitation, it would deepen the emotional stakes and make his eventual agreement to help more impactful.
  • The transition to the next scene feels abrupt. A more gradual shift, perhaps through a visual or auditory cue that links the excitement of the billboard to their next action, would create a smoother flow and maintain audience engagement.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a physical gag where Miguel's exaggerated skeleton walk causes a humorous reaction from passersby, enhancing the comedic element.
  • Streamline the dialogue about skeleton walking to avoid redundancy, perhaps by having Héctor react more dramatically to Miguel's antics.
  • Enhance the description of the billboard and its surroundings to create a more vivid and engaging visual for the audience, capturing the festive atmosphere of the event.
  • Deepen Héctor's reluctance by including a moment of hesitation or a humorous excuse that reveals his character's personality, making his eventual agreement feel more significant.
  • Create a more seamless transition to the next scene by incorporating a visual or auditory element that connects the excitement of the billboard to their next steps, such as the sound of music drawing them in.



Scene 27 -  Dress Dilemma
EXT. WAREHOUSE, BENEATH WINDOWS

Héctor uses his suspenders to slingshot his arm to a third
floor window. The hand taps on it.


INT. COSTUME ROOM

CECILIA, a costumer, turns from a costume to look at the
window. Héctor's hand waves. She rolls her eyes and goes to
open the window.

CECILIA
You better have my dress, Héctor!

HÉCTOR
Hola, Ceci!


EXT. BENEATH WINDOW

She lowers a ladder so Héctor, Miguel and Dante can climb up.
Héctor grabs his arm and reattaches it.


INT. COSTUME ROOM

They all crawl in through the window.




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MIGUEL
Hola.

HÉCTOR
Ceci, I lost the dress--

CECILIA
Ya lo sabía! I gotta dress forty
dancers by sunrise and thanks to
you, I'm one Frida short of an
opening number!

HÉCTOR
Ceci -- I know, Ceci. I know, I
know. Ceci -- Ceci... Ceci.
Ceci...

As Héctor tries to talk her down, Dante wanders away from
the costume area.

MIGUEL
Dante... Dante!

Miguel chases after him.
Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Comedy"]

Summary In a chaotic costume room, Héctor attempts to reassure Cecilia about a missing dress for an upcoming performance, but her frustration mounts as she demands answers. As Héctor struggles to calm her down, Miguel arrives, concerned about his wandering friend Dante, who has strayed away. The scene blends urgency and light-hearted frustration, culminating in Miguel chasing after Dante, leaving the dress conflict unresolved.
Strengths
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Creative concept
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant character development
  • Limited emotional depth

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, adventure, and fantasy elements, keeping the audience engaged and entertained. The fast-paced action and comedic dialogue create an enjoyable and memorable moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 7

The concept of the scene, focusing on Miguel and Héctor's attempt to disguise themselves, is creative and adds an element of fun and excitement to the story. The idea of using a costume room as a setting for their escapade is inventive and entertaining.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around Miguel and Héctor's mission to find a disguise, which drives the action forward and introduces new obstacles for the characters to overcome. The scene contributes to the overall narrative by setting up future events and character development.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh approach to a familiar situation of making amends for a mistake. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters of Miguel, Héctor, and Cecilia are well-developed and engaging, each bringing their own personality and humor to the scene. Their interactions and dialogue add depth to the story and create memorable moments for the audience.

Character Changes: 5

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the interactions between Miguel, Héctor, and Cecilia reveal more about their personalities and motivations, setting the stage for future development.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal is to make amends with Cecilia and rectify the mistake he made by losing the dress. This reflects his desire to be helpful and responsible.

External Goal: 7

Héctor's external goal is to retrieve the lost dress and assist Cecilia in dressing the dancers for the opening number. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in making things right with Cecilia.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is primarily driven by the characters' need to find a disguise and avoid detection, adding tension and urgency to their actions. The comedic elements help to lighten the mood and keep the conflict engaging.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from Cecilia's frustration and the challenge of dressing the dancers on time, adding a layer of conflict and tension.

High Stakes: 5

While the stakes are not particularly high in this scene, the characters face obstacles and challenges that drive the action forward and add tension to their mission. The comedic elements help to keep the stakes light and entertaining.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new challenge for the characters, setting up future events, and deepening the relationships between Miguel, Héctor, and Cecilia. It adds momentum to the narrative and keeps the audience engaged.

Unpredictability: 6

This scene is somewhat predictable in its outcome, as the audience can anticipate Héctor's attempts to make amends with Cecilia.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between responsibility and carelessness. Héctor's desire to make amends clashes with his previous mistake of losing the dress, highlighting the tension between being helpful and being irresponsible.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a range of emotions, including amusement, excitement, and anticipation, as Miguel and Héctor navigate the costume room and interact with Cecilia. The humor and fast-paced action contribute to the emotional impact of the scene.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, humorous, and character-driven, reflecting the personalities of Miguel, Héctor, and Cecilia. The banter between the characters adds to the comedic tone of the scene and keeps the audience entertained.

Engagement: 8

This scene is engaging because of the lively dialogue, humorous interactions, and the characters' dynamic actions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and humor, with a good balance between dialogue and action.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with proper scene headings and character actions.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions between locations and a focus on character interactions.


Critique
  • The scene effectively uses humor and character dynamics to establish the relationship between Héctor and Cecilia, showcasing Héctor's playful nature and Cecilia's frustration. However, the humor could be enhanced by adding more physical comedy or exaggerated reactions, especially from Cecilia, to emphasize the chaos of the situation.
  • The dialogue is functional but lacks a deeper emotional connection. While it conveys the urgency of the costume situation, it could benefit from more subtext or personal stakes for the characters. For instance, Cecilia's frustration could hint at her own dreams or pressures, making her more relatable.
  • The transition from the exterior to the interior of the warehouse is somewhat abrupt. A brief moment of tension or anticipation as they climb the ladder could heighten the stakes and create a smoother flow into the costume room.
  • Dante's wandering away serves as a plot device to create a distraction, but it feels a bit forced. It would be more effective if there were a clear reason for Dante's distraction that ties into the overall narrative or character development.
  • The scene lacks a strong visual element that could enhance the comedic tone. For example, describing the costume room's chaotic state or the costumes themselves could add a layer of visual humor and context to the urgency of the situation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Cecilia expresses her frustration in a more exaggerated or comedic way, perhaps by throwing a costume or dramatically lamenting her situation, to enhance the humor.
  • Incorporate subtext into the dialogue that reveals more about Cecilia's character and her relationship with Héctor. This could be done through a brief backstory or a shared memory that adds depth to their interaction.
  • Create a moment of tension as Miguel, Héctor, and Dante climb the ladder, perhaps by having them almost fall or get caught, which would build anticipation and make the entrance into the costume room more engaging.
  • Provide a clear motivation for Dante's wandering. Perhaps he is drawn to a specific costume or prop that relates to the story, which could lead to a humorous or pivotal moment later in the scene.
  • Enhance the visual description of the costume room to reflect the chaos of the situation. For example, describe the costumes in disarray or the lighting to create a more vivid and humorous atmosphere.



Scene 28 -  Creative Chaos in the Rehearsal Room
INT. REHEARSAL AREA

MIGUEL
We shouldn't be in here...

Miguel follows Dante through a giant warehouse, divided into
different artists workspaces. He passes papier-mâché
sculptures, giant paper cut out banners, a skeleton posing
nude for a painter...

Dante sniffs around. Suddenly an ALEBRIJE MONKEY jumps out
at Dante. The monkey starts riding Dante, tormenting him.
Miguel hustles after him.

MIGUEL
No, no, Dante! Ven acá!

The monkey jumps up onto the shoulder of FRIDA KAHLO, the
REAL Frida Kahlo, who stands in front of a rehearsal stage.
Miguel reins Dante in just as Frida turns to find them.

FRIDA
You! How did you get in here?

MIGUEL
I just followed my--




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Frida's eyes go wide when she sees Dante. She kneels and
takes his head in her hands.

FRIDA
Oh, the mighty Xolo dog...! Guider
of wandering spirits...!
(beat)
And whose spirit have you guided to
me?

Frida takes a closer look at Miguel.

MIGUEL
I don't think he's a spirit guide.

FRIDA
Ah-ah-ah. The alebrijes of this
world can take many forms... They
are as mysterious as they are
powerful...

The patterns on Frida's monkey swirl and he opens his mouth
to breath a blue fire. He fumbles at the end with a chesty
cough.

Then they look to Dante, who is chewing his own leg.
Suddenly, Frida turns back to Miguel.

FRIDA (CONT'D)
Or maybe he's just a dog. Come! I
need your eyes!

Frida guides him to view the rehearsal space.

FRIDA
You are the audience.
(beat)
Darkness. And from the darkness...
A giant PAPAYA!

Lights come up on a giant papaya prop.

FRIDA
Dancers emerge from the papaya and
the dancers are all me!

Leotarded, unibrowed dancers crawl around the sides of the
mesh papaya. Behind the papaya is an even larger half-
finished mesh structure.




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FRIDA (CONT'D)
And they go to drink from the milk
of their mother who is a cactus,
but who is also me. And her milk
is not milk but tears.
(to Miguel)
Is it too obvious?

MIGUEL
I think it's just the right amount
of obvious?
(beat)
It could use some music... Oh!
What if you did, like, doonk-doonk-
doonk-doonk...

Frida, inspired, cues some musicians who start playing the
tune.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Oh! And then it could go dittle-
ittle-dittle-ittle-dittle-ittle-
dittle-ittle -- WHAAA!

The violins follow; a trombone punctuates.

FRIDA
And... what if everything was on
fire? Yes! Fire everywhere!

The dancers gasp and look at each other, now concerned.

FRIDA
Inspired!
(leaning in)
You... you have the spirit of an
artist!

Miguel brightens. Frida turns back to the rehearsal.

FRIDA
The dancers exit, the music fades,
the lights go out! And Ernesto de
la Cruz rises to the stage!

A silhouette rises from a trap door. Miguel leans forward.

A spotlight shines on the silhouette revealing it to be a
mannequin.

MIGUEL
Huh?




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FRIDA
He does a couple of songs, the sun
rises, everyone cheers--

Miguel hustles up to Frida.

MIGUEL
Excuse me, where's the real de la
Cruz?

FRIDA
Ernesto doesn't do rehearsals.
He's too busy hosting that fancy
party at the top of his tower.

She gestures out a large window to a GRAND ESTATE lit up in
the distance, atop a steep hill.

Suddenly Héctor rounds the corner, out of breath.

HÉCTOR
Chamaco! You can't run off on me
like that! C'mon, stop pestering
the celebrities...

Héctor pulls Miguel away, but Miguel won't be wrangled.

MIGUEL
You said my great-great grandpa
would be here! He's halfway across
town, throwing some big party.

HÉCTOR
That bum! Who doesn't show up to
his own rehearsal?

MIGUEL
If you're such good friends, how
come he didn't invite you?

HÉCTOR
He's YOUR great-great grandpa. How
come he didn't invite YOU?

Héctor walks away from Miguel toward the musicians.

HÉCTOR
Hey Gustavo! You know anything
about this party?




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GUSTAVO
It's the hot ticket. But if you're
not on the guest list you're never
getting in, Chorizo...

MUSICIANS
Hey, it's Chorizo! / Choricito!

HÉCTOR
Ha ha, very funny guys. Very
funny.

MIGUEL
Chorizo?

GUSTAVO
(to Miguel, re: Héctor)
Oh, this guy's famous! Go on, go
on, ask him how he died!

Miguel looks to Héctor, eyebrow cocked.

HÉCTOR
I don't want to talk about it.

GUSTAVO
He choked on some CHORIZO!

The musicians laugh. Miguel tries to stifle a giggle.

HÉCTOR
I didn't choke, okay -- I got food
poisoning, which is a big
difference!

More laughter.

HÉCTOR
(to Miguel)
This is why I don't like
musicians... bunch of self-
important jerks!

MIGUEL
Hey, I’m a musician.

HÉCTOR
You are?




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GUSTAVO
Well, if you really want to get to
Ernesto, there IS that music
competition at the Plaza de la
Cruz. Winner gets to play at his
party...

Miguel’s wheels start turning.

HÉCTOR
No, no, no, chamaco, you are loco
if you think--

Miguel looks to his hands, progressed in their skeletal
transformation.

MIGUEL
I need to get my great-great
grandfather's blessing.

Miguel looks up to Héctor.

MIGUEL (CONT’D)
You know where I can get a guitar?

Héctor sighs.

HÉCTOR
I know a guy...

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Genres: ["Animation","Comedy","Adventure"]

Summary In a vibrant rehearsal area, Miguel chases his dog Dante, who is being teased by an alebrije monkey. They meet the real Frida Kahlo, who mistakes Dante for a spirit guide and sparks a creative brainstorming session for a performance featuring a giant papaya. As Frida's inspiration grows, Miguel suggests musical elements, leading to humorous exchanges about Ernesto de la Cruz's absence. Héctor arrives, frustrated with Miguel's antics, and they discuss the upcoming music competition that could grant Miguel his great-great-grandfather's blessing. The scene concludes with Miguel's determination to find a guitar, while Héctor reluctantly agrees to assist him.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Vibrant setting
  • Humorous interactions
Weaknesses
  • Some predictable elements
  • Limited character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces new characters, sets up a key plot point, and maintains a light-hearted and engaging tone throughout.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on a music competition, the quest for a blessing, and the introduction of new characters, is well-developed and adds depth to the overall story.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene moves the story forward by introducing new challenges and goals for the characters, setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique elements like alebrijes, Frida Kahlo, and a giant papaya prop, offering fresh and imaginative approaches to storytelling. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene are engaging, with distinct personalities and motivations that drive the interactions and humor in the scene.

Character Changes: 6

There is some character development, particularly in Miguel's determination to seek his great-great-grandfather's blessing and Héctor's willingness to help him.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to prove himself as an artist and gain recognition for his talent. This reflects his deeper desire for validation and acceptance of his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to find his great-great grandfather, Ernesto de la Cruz, and get his blessing to pursue his musical dreams. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of navigating the world of artists and musicians to achieve his dream.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily driven by the characters' goals and interactions.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts arising from Miguel's goals, interactions with other characters, and the challenges he faces in pursuing his dreams.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in the scene, with characters pursuing personal goals and facing challenges that could impact their journey.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new goals, conflicts, and relationships that will impact future events.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected interactions between characters, fantastical elements, and twists in the plot, keeping the audience intrigued.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of artistic expression and identity. Frida Kahlo's eccentric creativity challenges Miguel's perception of art and pushes him to think outside the box.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, with moments of humor, excitement, and curiosity that engage the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reveals character traits and relationships effectively, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, drama, and fantastical elements, keeping the audience invested in Miguel's journey and artistic aspirations.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and character interactions, maintaining a dynamic and engaging rhythm.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a setup, conflict, and resolution, maintaining a good pacing and rhythm for its genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively blends humor and creativity, showcasing Miguel's imaginative spirit and his interactions with Frida Kahlo. However, the pacing feels slightly rushed, particularly in the transition from Miguel's playful suggestions to Frida's enthusiastic responses. This could benefit from a more gradual build-up to allow the audience to fully absorb the whimsical nature of the rehearsal.
  • Frida's character is portrayed with a strong sense of artistic flair, but her dialogue could be more concise. Some lines, such as her explanation of the dancers and the papaya, feel overly verbose and could be streamlined to maintain the scene's momentum. This would help keep the audience engaged without losing the essence of her character.
  • The introduction of the alebrije monkey adds a fun element, but its role in the scene could be more clearly defined. While it serves as a catalyst for Miguel's chase, its purpose in the larger narrative isn't fully realized here. Clarifying its significance could enhance the scene's thematic depth.
  • The dialogue between Miguel and Héctor is humorous and adds a layer of camaraderie, but it could benefit from more emotional stakes. Miguel's determination to find his great-great-grandfather feels somewhat overshadowed by the comedic elements. Incorporating a moment of vulnerability or urgency in Miguel's dialogue could strengthen the emotional resonance of the scene.
  • The visual elements are vibrant and imaginative, but the scene could benefit from more descriptive language to paint a clearer picture of the rehearsal space and the characters' actions. This would help the reader visualize the setting and the characters' interactions more vividly.
Suggestions
  • Consider slowing down the pacing in certain areas to allow for more character development and emotional depth, particularly in Miguel's interactions with Frida and Héctor.
  • Streamline Frida's dialogue to make her artistic vision more impactful without losing her unique voice. Focus on key phrases that encapsulate her ideas.
  • Clarify the role of the alebrije monkey in the scene. Perhaps give it a line or two that hints at its significance in the story, making it feel more integral to the narrative.
  • Incorporate a moment where Miguel expresses his deeper motivations for finding his great-great-grandfather, adding emotional stakes to his playful banter with Héctor.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the rehearsal area and the characters' actions to create a more immersive experience for the reader, allowing them to visualize the whimsical setting more clearly.



Scene 29 -  The Glowing Footprint
EXT. UNDERPASS TUNNEL - NIGHT

Pepita sweeps across the sky, landing in a darkened corner.
She casts a shadow on the wall, then lurches into the light.
She sniffs out the spot where Héctor painted Miguel's face,
finding a canister of shoe polish. She lets out a low growl.

The Dead Riveras follow after her.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Have you found him, Pepita? Have
you found our boy?

Pepita breathes on the ground, revealing a footprint. It
glows for a moment. The family leans in to inspect.

TÍA ROSITA
A footprint!




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PAPÁ JULIO
It's a Rivera boot!

TÍO OSCAR
Size seven...

TÍO FELIPE
...and a half.

TÍA VICTORIA
Pronated.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel.

Pepita leans forward, breathes again, and the glow spreads to
reveal a trail of footprints.

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Genres: ["Fantasy","Adventure","Comedy"]

Summary In a dark underpass tunnel, Pepita, the spirit guide, discovers a canister of shoe polish and breathes on the ground, revealing a glowing footprint belonging to Miguel. The Rivera family, including Mamá Imelda and Tía Rosita, excitedly examines the footprint, confirming its size and characteristics. Their urgency turns to hope as they realize Miguel is nearby, and Pepita reveals a trail of footprints for them to follow.
Strengths
  • Engaging blend of fantasy, adventure, and comedy elements
  • Strong emotional impact and character development
  • Intriguing concept and theme
Weaknesses
  • Potential for confusion with multiple characters and interactions
  • Pacing may be too fast for some viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends fantasy elements with humor and mystery, keeping the audience engaged and curious about Miguel's whereabouts. The introduction of Pepita adds a sense of urgency and excitement to the search.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the family searching for Miguel in the Land of the Dead is intriguing and well-developed, with the introduction of Pepita as a spirit guide adding a unique twist to the scene. The blend of fantasy, adventure, and comedy elements works well to drive the narrative forward.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene focuses on the search for Miguel and his family's efforts to find him in the Land of the Dead. The introduction of Pepita as a guide and the discovery of the footprints add depth to the storyline, keeping the audience invested in Miguel's fate.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique blend of magical elements and family dynamics, with authentic character interactions and a fresh approach to the afterlife theme.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters in the scene, particularly Miguel's family members and Pepita, are well-developed and add emotional depth to the search for Miguel. The interactions between the characters reveal their personalities and motivations, driving the narrative forward.

Character Changes: 7

The characters in the scene, particularly Miguel's family members, undergo changes as they navigate the search for Miguel and confront their fears and concerns. The experience of searching for Miguel brings them closer together and strengthens their bond.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to find Miguel, reflecting her deep desire to reunite the family and bring closure to their situation.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to follow the trail of footprints to locate Miguel, reflecting the immediate challenge of finding him in the dark tunnel.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene arises from the family's search for Miguel and the uncertainty surrounding his whereabouts. The sense of urgency and concern adds tension to the narrative, driving the characters to find a resolution.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the challenge of finding Miguel in the dark tunnel adding suspense and uncertainty.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene as the family searches for Miguel in the Land of the Dead, facing uncertainty and danger in their quest to find him. The sense of urgency and concern heighten the stakes, driving the characters to take action.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by advancing the search for Miguel and introducing new elements, such as Pepita's role as a guide and the discovery of the footprints. The scene builds suspense and anticipation for the resolution of Miguel's disappearance.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the magical elements and unexpected discoveries, keeping the audience on edge.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the belief in the afterlife and the connection between the living and the dead. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about family and loyalty.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, as the family's concern for Miguel and their determination to find him evoke feelings of empathy and connection. The bond between the characters and the sense of love and loyalty add depth to the emotional resonance of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the urgency and concern of the family members as they search for Miguel. The interactions between the characters are engaging and reveal their relationships and dynamics.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mysterious atmosphere, emotional stakes, and the sense of urgency in finding Miguel.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense as the characters follow the trail of footprints.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively utilizes Pepita, the spirit guide, to create a sense of urgency and connection to Miguel's journey. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic. The characters' lines feel somewhat expository and could benefit from more emotional weight or urgency to enhance the stakes of the search for Miguel.
  • The visual elements, such as the glowing footprint and the family leaning in to inspect it, are engaging and create a sense of wonder. However, the scene could be enhanced by incorporating more sensory details, such as sounds or smells, to immerse the audience further into the atmosphere of the underpass tunnel.
  • The dialogue among the family members is informative but lacks distinct character voices. Each character should have a unique way of speaking that reflects their personality, which would help to differentiate them and make the scene more lively.
  • The pacing of the scene feels a bit slow due to the focus on the dialogue about the footprint. While it's important to establish the discovery, the scene could benefit from a quicker transition to the next action, perhaps by interspersing more physical movement or reactions from the characters as they discover the trail.
  • The reveal of the glowing footprint is a strong visual moment, but it could be more impactful if the characters reacted with a mix of excitement and concern, emphasizing the urgency of finding Miguel. This would heighten the emotional stakes and engage the audience more effectively.
Suggestions
  • Revise the dialogue to include more emotional depth and urgency, perhaps by having characters express their fears or hopes regarding Miguel's safety.
  • Incorporate sensory details to enhance the atmosphere, such as the sounds of the night or the smell of the tunnel, to create a more immersive experience.
  • Give each family member a distinct voice or catchphrase that reflects their personality, making the dialogue feel more natural and engaging.
  • Consider adding physical actions or reactions from the characters as they discover the footprint, such as gasps or hurried movements, to create a sense of urgency and excitement.
  • Enhance the emotional stakes by having the characters express their feelings about Miguel's disappearance more vividly, perhaps through a brief moment of reflection or shared concern before they follow the trail.



Scene 30 -  Stairway to Dreams
EXT. NARROW STAIRWAY

Miguel follows Héctor down a steep stairway. Miguel looks to
his bony knuckles, concern on his face.

HÉCTOR
Why the heck would you wanna be a
musician?

MIGUEL
My great-great grandpa was a
musician.

HÉCTOR
...Who spent his life performing
like a monkey for complete
strangers. Blech, no, no thank
you, guácala, no...

MIGUEL
Whadda you know?

As Miguel descends the staircase, de la Cruz's distant
glowing tower is obscured by old forgotten buildings.

MIGUEL
So, how far is this guitar anyway?

HÉCTOR
We're almost there...




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Héctor jumps from the stairway and crashes on the ground
below. But his bones reassemble immediately.

HÉCTOR (CONT’D)
Keep up, chamaco, come on!

Héctor leads Miguel through a stone archway.
Genres: ["Fantasy","Adventure","Comedy"]

Summary Miguel follows Héctor down a steep stairway, expressing concern about his bony knuckles. Héctor dismisses Miguel's passion for music, questioning its worth, while Miguel defends his dream by mentioning his musical ancestry. As they navigate the stairs, the glowing tower of de la Cruz is briefly obscured. Miguel asks about a guitar, and Héctor assures him they are close. Suddenly, Héctor jumps off the stairway, his bones reassembling, and encourages Miguel to keep up as they pass through a stone archway.
Strengths
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Fantastical setting
Weaknesses
  • Low conflict level
  • Some predictable elements

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, curiosity, and excitement, keeping the audience engaged and entertained. The interactions between Miguel and Héctor, the exploration of the Land of the Dead, and the quest for the musician's blessing add depth and intrigue to the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel seeking his great-great-grandfather's blessing in the Land of the Dead is intriguing and drives the narrative forward. The exploration of family history, music, and memory adds depth to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and propels the story forward as Miguel and Héctor search for de la Cruz. The quest for the musician's blessing introduces stakes and challenges that keep the audience invested.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique blend of traditional Mexican culture, magical realism, and family dynamics. The dialogue feels authentic and the magical elements add a fresh twist to the familiar theme of family heritage.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters of Miguel and Héctor are well-developed and their interactions are entertaining and revealing. Their dynamic drives the scene forward and adds depth to their relationship.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes some character development as he learns more about his family history and the importance of memory and music. His interactions with Héctor also shape his perspective and goals.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to understand and connect with his family's musical heritage. This reflects his deeper need for identity and belonging.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to find the guitar that belonged to his great-great-grandfather. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in uncovering his family's secrets.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is relatively low, focusing more on the quest for the musician's blessing and the interactions between the characters. However, there is tension and obstacles that drive the story forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Héctor challenging Miguel's beliefs and pushing him to confront his family's legacy.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes in the scene are moderate, focusing on Miguel's quest for the musician's blessing and the potential consequences of not obtaining it. The importance of family, memory, and music adds weight to the outcome.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by advancing Miguel's quest for the musician's blessing and deepening the exploration of family history and memory. The events and revelations propel the narrative towards its resolution.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the magical elements and the unexpected twists in the characters' interactions.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Héctor's cynical view of musicians as performers for strangers and Miguel's desire to honor his family's musical legacy. This challenges Miguel's beliefs about the value of music and performance.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, balancing humor and curiosity with moments of concern and depth. The exploration of family history and memory adds emotional resonance to the story.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and engaging, capturing the humor and curiosity of the scene. The banter between Miguel and Héctor adds to their relationship and reveals more about their personalities.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the witty dialogue, mysterious atmosphere, and the emotional journey of the characters.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, leading to a climactic moment with Héctor's fall.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with proper scene headings and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character motivations and progression of the plot.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Miguel and Héctor effectively establishes their contrasting perspectives on music, with Miguel's passion clashing against Héctor's cynicism. This dynamic adds depth to their relationship and sets the stage for character development.
  • The use of humor in Héctor's dismissal of musicians as performing 'like a monkey for complete strangers' is engaging and lightens the tone, but it could be enhanced by adding more playful banter or a humorous anecdote from Héctor's past to illustrate his point.
  • The visual imagery of the glowing tower of de la Cruz being obscured by old buildings serves as a metaphor for Miguel's journey and aspirations being clouded by the past. However, this could be further emphasized by describing the contrast between the vibrant glow and the dullness of the surroundings, enhancing the stakes of Miguel's quest.
  • The transition from the stairway to the stone archway is a nice visual cue, but it could benefit from a more vivid description of the archway itself, perhaps hinting at its significance or the atmosphere it creates as they pass through it.
  • Héctor's jump and immediate reassembly of bones is a humorous moment that showcases the whimsical nature of the world they inhabit. However, it might be more impactful if Miguel reacts with a mix of awe and confusion, highlighting his adjustment to the surreal aspects of the Land of the Dead.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief flashback or a story from Héctor that illustrates why he feels negatively about being a musician, which could deepen the audience's understanding of his character.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the stairway and the archway to create a more immersive experience for the audience, perhaps by incorporating sensory details like sounds or smells that evoke the atmosphere of the Land of the Dead.
  • Include a moment where Miguel expresses his determination or excitement about finding the guitar, reinforcing his passion and contrasting it with Héctor's reluctance, which could heighten the emotional stakes.
  • Explore the possibility of adding a small obstacle or humorous incident as they descend the stairs, which could serve to further develop their relationship and provide comic relief.
  • Consider ending the scene with a stronger emotional hook, perhaps by having Miguel express a personal connection to music that resonates with Héctor, setting up a potential turning point in their dynamic.



Scene 31 -  Reunion in the Shanty Town
EXT. SHANTY TOWN

Graffiti on the archway depicts skeletal angels with wings
the color of marigolds.

Inside the archway, a group of ratty skeletons huddle around
a burning trashcan and laugh raucously. They are gray and
dusty, not unlike Héctor, but there's a camaraderie about
them.

RATTY GROUP
COUSIN HÉCTOR!!

HÉCTOR
Eh! These guys!

RATTY MEMBER
HÉCTOR!!

HÉCTOR
Hey Tío! Qué onda!

MIGUEL
These people are all your family?

HÉCTOR
Eh, in a way... We're all the ones
with no photos or ofrendas, no
family to go home to. Nearly
forgotten, you know?
(beat)
So, we all call each other cousin,
or tío, or whatever.

They approach three old ladies playing cards around a wooden
crate. One, TÍA CHELO looks up.

TÍA CHELO
Héctor!

HÉCTOR
Tía Chelo! He-hey!

Héctor hands them a bottle.



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OLD TIAS
Muchas gracias!

HÉCTOR
Hey, hey! Save some for me! Is
Chicharrón around?

TÍA CHELO
In the bungalow. I don't know if
he's in the mood for visitors...

HÉCTOR
Who doesn't like a visit from
Cousin Héctor?
Genres: ["Fantasy","Comedy","Adventure"]

Summary In a vibrant shanty town, Héctor and Miguel encounter a group of forgotten skeletons who embrace each other as family. Héctor joyfully reunites with his relatives, including Tía Chelo, sharing laughter and a bottle while Miguel observes the warmth of their connections. The scene highlights themes of belonging and camaraderie among the forgotten, culminating in Héctor's inquiry about another relative, Chicharrón.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Limited conflict
  • Moderate emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, heart, and whimsy to create an engaging and emotionally resonant moment in the story. The introduction of Héctor's 'family' adds depth to the world-building and character development.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of forgotten skeletons forming a makeshift family in the Land of the Dead is a unique and compelling idea that adds depth to the world-building and explores themes of memory, family, and belonging.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene moves the story forward by introducing new challenges and obstacles for Miguel, setting up his quest for his great-great-grandfather's blessing and deepening the emotional stakes of the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique setting and group of characters, exploring themes of family and belonging in a fresh and heartfelt way. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The scene features strong character interactions and development, particularly between Héctor and Miguel, as well as the introduction of Héctor's 'family' of forgotten skeletons, adding depth and complexity to the ensemble cast.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes some character growth in the scene as he learns more about his family history and the importance of memory and connection. Héctor also experiences growth as he helps Miguel on his quest.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal in this scene is to connect with his makeshift family and find a sense of belonging among those who are also forgotten. This reflects his deeper need for connection and acceptance.

External Goal: 7

Héctor's external goal is to find his friend Chicharrón and connect with him. This reflects the immediate challenge of reuniting with a friend in a difficult environment.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some conflict in the scene, particularly in Miguel's quest for his great-great-grandfather's blessing and the emotional tension between characters, the overall tone is more lighthearted and whimsical.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and tension, but not overwhelming, leaving room for character growth and development.

High Stakes: 7

While the stakes are not incredibly high in this scene, there is a sense of urgency and emotional weight in Miguel's quest for his great-great-grandfather's blessing and the resolution of his family's curse.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new challenges, deepening character relationships, and setting up key plot points for the resolution of Miguel's family curse.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected connections and relationships that develop between the characters, challenging traditional narratives of family and belonging.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the value of family and belonging. Héctor and his makeshift family find connection and support in each other, challenging traditional notions of family and relationships.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, balancing humor with heartfelt moments and setting up emotional stakes for Miguel's journey and the resolution of his family's curse.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is engaging, humorous, and emotionally resonant, effectively conveying the relationships between the characters and advancing the plot in a natural and compelling way.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the authentic character interactions, humor, and emotional depth that draw the audience into the world of the shanty town and its inhabitants.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotion, allowing for moments of humor and warmth to shine through in the character interactions.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue that enhance the visual and emotional impact of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively introducing the setting, characters, and conflict in a coherent and engaging manner.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes a sense of community among the forgotten skeletons, which adds depth to the world-building. The camaraderie among the characters is palpable, and it highlights the theme of family beyond traditional ties. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic; while it conveys the necessary information, it lacks a certain punch that could make the interactions more engaging.
  • Héctor's introduction to this group is warm and inviting, but the scene could benefit from more visual descriptions that emphasize the setting's atmosphere. For instance, describing the sounds of laughter, the flickering light from the trashcan, or the smell of smoke could enhance the sensory experience for the audience.
  • The dialogue between Héctor and the ratty group feels somewhat expository. While it is important to convey the backstory of these characters, it could be woven into the dialogue more naturally. Instead of stating that they are forgotten, perhaps a character could share a humorous or poignant anecdote that illustrates their situation.
  • The transition from the previous scene to this one is smooth, but the pacing could be improved. The scene feels a bit rushed, especially when introducing the new characters. Allowing for a moment of pause or reaction from Miguel could help ground the audience in the moment and give them time to absorb the new environment.
  • The character of Tía Chelo is introduced but not fully developed in this scene. Providing a brief, memorable quirk or line for her could make her more distinct and memorable, enhancing the overall richness of the ensemble.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate more sensory details to create a vivid atmosphere. Describe the sounds, smells, and sights of the shanty town to immerse the audience in the setting.
  • Consider adding a humorous or poignant anecdote from one of the ratty skeletons to convey their backstory more organically, rather than relying solely on exposition.
  • Allow for a moment of pause after Héctor's introduction to the group, giving Miguel a chance to react and the audience time to absorb the new characters and setting.
  • Develop Tía Chelo's character further by giving her a memorable line or quirk that distinguishes her from the other characters, making her more relatable and engaging.
  • Revise the dialogue to include more playful banter or conflict among the characters, which could enhance the camaraderie and make the interactions feel more lively and authentic.



Scene 32 -  A Song for Chicharrón
INT. SHANTY BUNGALOW TENT

Héctor holds the curtain open. Miguel and Dante walk in.

The tent is cramped, dark, and quiet. Piles are organized
everywhere: stacks of old dishes, a drawer full of pocket
watches, magazines, records. This place belongs to a
collector of things. Miguel almost knocks one stack over.

Héctor spies a hammock piled with old junk, a dusty hat on
top. He lifts the hat and finds the grumpy face of
CHICHARRÓN.

HÉCTOR
Buenas noches, Chicharrón!

CHICHARRÓN
I don't want to see your stupid
face, Héctor.

HÉCTOR
C'mon, it's Día de Muertos! I
brought you a little offering!

CHICHARRÓN
Get out of here...

HÉCTOR
I would, Cheech, but the thing
is... me and my friend, Miguel, we
really need to borrow your guitar.

CHICHARRÓN
My guitar?!

HÉCTOR
Yes?



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CHICHARRÓN
My prized, beloved guitar...?

HÉCTOR
I promise we'll bring it right
back.

Chicharrón sits up, incensed.

CHICHARRÓN
Like the time you promised to bring
back my van?

HÉCTOR
Uh...

CHICHARRÓN
Or my mini-fridge?

HÉCTOR
Ah, you see–-

CHICHARRÓN
Or my good napkins? My lasso? My
femur?!

HÉCTOR
No, no, not like those times.

CHICHARRÓN
Where’s my femur?! You--

Chicharrón raises his finger to give a tongue lashing. But
then he weakens and collapses in his hammock, a golden
flicker flashing through his bones. Héctor rushes forward.

HÉCTOR
Whoa, whoa -- you okay, amigo?

CHICHARRÓN
I'm fading, Héctor. I can feel it.
(looking to guitar)
I couldn't even play that thing if
I wanted to.
(beat)
You play me something.

Héctor looks surprised.

HÉCTOR
You know I don't play anymore,
Cheech. The guitar's for the kid--




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CHICHARRÓN
You want it, you got to earn it...

Héctor sighs, then reaches over Chicharrón and takes the
instrument.

HÉCTOR
Only for you, amigo. Any requests?

Héctor begins tuning the guitar.

CHICHARRÓN
You know my favorite, Héctor.

Héctor begins a lovely, lilting tune. Chicharrón smiles.
Miguel's eyes go wide at Héctor's skill.

HÉCTOR
(singing)
WELL EVERYONE KNOWS JUANITA,
HER EYES EACH A DIFFERENT COLOR.
HER TEETH STICK OUT,
AND HER CHIN GOES IN,
AND HER...

Héctor eyes Miguel.

HÉCTOR (CONT’D)
...KNUCKLES THEY DRAG ON THE FLOOR.

CHICHARRÓN
Those aren't the words!

HÉCTOR
There are children present.
(continuing)
HER HAIR IS LIKE A BRIAR,
SHE STANDS IN A BOW-LEGGED STANCE.
AND IF I WEREN'T SO UGLY,
SHE'D POSSIBLY GIVE ME A CHANCE!

Héctor finishes with a soft flourish.

Chicharrón is tickled, joyful. For a moment he's present and
bright.

CHICHARRÓN
Brings back memories. Gracias...

His eyes close. He looks at peace. Héctor looks sad.

Suddenly, the edges of Chicharrón's bones begin to glow. A
soft, beautiful light. Then... he dissolves into dust.



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Miguel is stunned, concerned.

Héctor picks up his shot glass, lifts it in honor, and
drinks. He places it rim down next to Chicharrón's glass,
which is still full.

MIGUEL
Wait... what happened?

HÉCTOR
He's been forgotten.
(beat)
When there's no one left in the
living world who remembers you, you
disappear from this world. We call
it the "Final Death."

MIGUEL
Where did he go?

HÉCTOR
No one knows.

Miguel has a thought.

MIGUEL
But I've met him... I could
remember him, when I go back...

HÉCTOR
No, it doesn't work like that,
chamaco. Our memories... they have
to be passed down by those who knew
us in life -- in the stories they
tell about us. But there's no one
left alive to pass down Cheech's
stories...

Miguel is deep in thought.

Héctor puts his hand on Miguel's back, suddenly cheerful.

HÉCTOR (CONT’D)
Hey, it happens to everyone
eventually.

He gives Miguel the guitar.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
C'mon "de la Cruzcito." You've got
a contest to win.




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Héctor throws open the curtain and exits. Miguel looks back
at the glasses, then turns and follows.
Genres: ["Animation","Fantasy","Adventure"]

Summary In a cramped, dark tent during Día de Muertos, Héctor and Miguel encounter Chicharrón, who is initially grumpy about lending his prized guitar due to past grievances with Héctor. After some banter, Chicharrón reveals he is fading and asks Héctor to play a song. Héctor reluctantly agrees, bringing joy to Chicharrón before he dissolves into dust, marking his 'Final Death.' This poignant moment teaches Miguel about the importance of memories and inspires him to focus on his upcoming contest.
Strengths
  • Exploration of memory and legacy
  • Emotional depth
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Limited action

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, emotionally resonant, and introduces important themes and concepts. It effectively blends humor with poignant moments, creating a memorable and impactful scene.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of being forgotten in the afterlife, the Final Death, and the importance of memories are central to the scene. These concepts are explored in a meaningful and thought-provoking way.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene advances the story by introducing key themes, concepts, and character motivations. It sets up important conflicts and resolutions for future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the concept of memory and legacy after death, exploring the idea of being forgotten and the consequences of not being remembered.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-developed and engaging. Their interactions and emotional journeys add depth to the story and create compelling dynamics.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo emotional changes and realizations in the scene, particularly in relation to the concept of the Final Death and the importance of memories.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal is to reconnect with his past and honor the memory of his friend Chicharrón. This reflects his desire for redemption and to make amends for past mistakes.

External Goal: 7.5

Héctor's external goal is to borrow Chicharrón's guitar for Miguel to use in a contest. This reflects the immediate challenge of helping Miguel achieve his dream.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

While there is not a high level of external conflict in the scene, there is internal conflict related to the characters' emotional journeys and the concept of the Final Death.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene comes from Chicharrón's reluctance to lend his guitar, adding tension and conflict to the interaction between the characters.

High Stakes: 7

While the stakes are not life-threatening, the emotional stakes are high due to the characters' journeys, the concept of the Final Death, and the importance of memories.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing key plot points, conflicts, and character motivations. It sets up important developments for future scenes.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twist of Chicharrón's disappearance and the revelation of the 'Final Death' concept, adding a layer of mystery and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of being remembered after death. Chicharrón faces the 'Final Death' because he has been forgotten, highlighting the importance of legacy and memory.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact due to its exploration of loss, memory, and the consequences of being forgotten. It elicits a range of emotions from the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is engaging, humorous, and emotionally resonant. It effectively conveys the characters' personalities and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, humor, and the mystery surrounding Chicharrón's fate, keeping the audience invested in the characters and their journey.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue, action, and reflection that keeps the story moving forward while allowing for emotional resonance.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows standard formatting for its genre, with clear action lines, dialogue, and scene descriptions that enhance the reader's understanding.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a well-defined beginning, middle, and end, effectively building tension and emotion throughout.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the emotional weight of memory and the consequences of being forgotten, which is central to the film's themes. Chicharrón's fading serves as a poignant reminder of the importance of familial connections and storytelling.
  • The dialogue between Héctor and Chicharrón is humorous and engaging, showcasing their history and the playful banter that defines their relationship. However, the humor sometimes undercuts the emotional gravity of Chicharrón's situation, which could be balanced better.
  • The visual description of the cramped, dark tent filled with collected items sets a strong atmosphere, enhancing the sense of nostalgia and the weight of forgotten memories. However, more specific details about the items could deepen the audience's connection to Chicharrón's character and his past.
  • Chicharrón's character is introduced effectively, but his backstory could be fleshed out more to create a stronger emotional impact when he fades away. Providing a brief glimpse into his life or a specific memory could enhance the audience's investment in his fate.
  • The transition from humor to sadness is well-executed, but the pacing could be improved. The scene feels slightly rushed towards the end, particularly when Chicharrón dissolves into dust. Allowing a moment of silence or reflection after his passing could heighten the emotional impact.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief flashback or a memory shared between Héctor and Chicharrón to deepen their relationship and make Chicharrón's fate more impactful.
  • Balance the humor with the emotional stakes by allowing for a moment of silence or reflection after Chicharrón fades away, giving the audience time to process the loss.
  • Enhance the visual details of the tent by describing specific items that reflect Chicharrón's personality or past, which could create a stronger emotional connection.
  • Explore Chicharrón's character further by incorporating a line or two that hints at his life before death, making his fading feel more significant.
  • Consider adjusting the dialogue to maintain the humor while also acknowledging the seriousness of Chicharrón's situation, ensuring that the tone remains consistent throughout the scene.



Scene 33 -  Musical Revelations in the Plaza
EXT. LAND OF THE DEAD

Héctor and Miguel hang off the back of a moving trolley.
Miguel holds Héctor's photo in his hands, scanning it, while
Héctor fiddles on the guitar idly.

MIGUEL
You told me you hated musicians,
you never said you were one.

HÉCTOR
How do you think I knew your great-
great grandpa? We used to play
music together. Taught him
everything he knows.

Héctor plays a fancy riff, but botches the last note.

MIGUEL
No manches! You played with
Ernesto de la Cruz, the greatest
musician of all time?

HÉCTOR
Ha-ha, you're funny! Greatest
eyebrows of all time maybe but his
music, eh, not so much.

MIGUEL
You don't know what you're talking
about...

The trolley arrives at the stop for the PLAZA DE LA CRUZ.
There's a giant statue of Ernesto de la Cruz in the center.
Miguel pockets Héctor’s photo.

HÉCTOR
Welcome to the Plaza de la Cruz!
(beat)
Showtime, chamaco!

Héctor hands the guitar to Miguel.

QUICK CUTS: Energetic plaza shots. Lights and colors,
beautiful dresses, violins, pyrotechnic bullfight, dancing.
A t-shirt vendor is selling "de la Cruz" shirts.

VENDOR
Llévelo! T-shirts! Bobble-heads!



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A stage is set up in the plaza.
Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the vibrant Plaza de la Cruz of the Land of the Dead, Héctor shares his musical history with Miguel, revealing his connection to Miguel's great-great-grandfather and his past with Ernesto de la Cruz. Despite Miguel's excitement about Héctor's ties to the famous musician, Héctor humorously downplays de la Cruz's talent. The lively atmosphere sets the stage for their adventure as Héctor hands Miguel a guitar, signaling the beginning of their journey together.
Strengths
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Vibrant setting
  • Humorous dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some predictable plot elements
  • Slight lack of depth in secondary characters

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted with a good balance of humor, excitement, and emotional depth, setting up important plot points and character dynamics.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring family connections, music, and the afterlife is well-developed and adds depth to the story. The scene effectively introduces key themes and sets up future developments.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses smoothly, introducing new challenges and goals for the characters while maintaining a sense of adventure and discovery.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family and tradition, with unique character dynamics and cultural elements. The dialogue feels authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-defined and engaging, with clear motivations and conflicts that drive the scene forward. The interactions between Miguel and Héctor are particularly compelling.

Character Changes: 7

Both Miguel and Héctor undergo some development in the scene, deepening their relationship and revealing new aspects of their personalities.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to uncover the truth about his family history and connect with his ancestors. This reflects his deeper need for belonging and understanding his identity.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to find a way to return to the Land of the Living before sunrise. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in the story.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily driven by the characters' goals and the challenges they face in the Land of the Dead.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene adds tension and conflict, creating obstacles for the protagonist to overcome. The audience is left unsure of how the situation will resolve.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high in the scene, as Miguel and Héctor face challenges that could impact their journey and relationships.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing key plot points, setting up future conflicts, and advancing the characters' goals.

Unpredictability: 7.5

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the dialogue and character interactions. The audience is kept on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between honoring family traditions and pursuing personal dreams. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about loyalty and individuality.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, with moments of humor, inspiration, and connection that resonate with the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and engaging, capturing the personalities of the characters and adding humor and depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dynamic characters, witty dialogue, and vibrant setting. The fast-paced action keeps the audience hooked.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a balance between action and dialogue, keeping the story moving forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Miguel and Héctor effectively establishes their relationship and the tension between Miguel's admiration for de la Cruz and Héctor's dismissive attitude. However, the humor could be enhanced by adding more playful banter or contrasting their personalities further.
  • Héctor's character is intriguing, but his motivations could be clearer. While he mentions knowing Miguel's great-great-grandfather, it would be beneficial to explore his feelings about music and his past more deeply, perhaps through a brief flashback or a more emotional reflection.
  • The transition from the trolley to the Plaza de la Cruz is visually engaging, but the scene could benefit from a stronger emotional anchor. Miguel's excitement about arriving at the plaza feels somewhat abrupt; adding a moment of reflection or anticipation could enhance the emotional weight.
  • The quick cuts to the energetic plaza shots are visually stimulating, but they risk overshadowing the character dynamics. It would be helpful to intersperse these visuals with reactions from Miguel and Héctor to ground the excitement in their experience.
  • The introduction of the vendor selling merchandise is a nice touch, adding to the vibrant atmosphere. However, it feels slightly disconnected from the main action. Integrating the vendor's dialogue with Miguel and Héctor's interaction could create a more cohesive scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel expresses his awe or disbelief at Héctor's connection to de la Cruz, which could deepen their bond and highlight Miguel's passion for music.
  • Incorporate a brief flashback or anecdote from Héctor about his time playing music with de la Cruz to provide more context and emotional depth to his character.
  • Enhance the emotional transition into the plaza by having Miguel share his hopes or fears about performing, which would create a stronger connection to the vibrant setting.
  • Balance the energetic plaza visuals with character reactions, allowing the audience to feel Miguel's excitement and Héctor's skepticism simultaneously.
  • Integrate the vendor's dialogue into the main conversation, perhaps by having Miguel react to the merchandise, which could serve as a humorous moment and reinforce the cultural context.



Scene 34 -  The Battle Begins
EXT. ON STAGE

An EMCEE greets her audience.

EMCEE
Bienvenidos a todos! Who's ready
for some música?

The audience whoops.

EMCEE (CONT'D)
It's a battle of the bands, amigos!
The winner gets to play for the
maestro himself, Ernesto de la
Cruz, at his fiesta tonight!

The audience cheers. Héctor elbows Miguel as they head
backstage.

HÉCTOR
That's our ticket, muchacho.

EMCEE
Let the competition begin!

QUICK MONTAGE: Acts perform on stage -- a tuba/violin act, a
saxophone player, a hard-core metal band, a kid who plays
marimba on the back of a giant iguana alebrije, a DJ with a
laptop and keyboard setup, a dog orchestra, nuns playing
accordions...
Genres: ["Musical","Comedy","Adventure"]

Summary The scene opens with an EMCEE energizing the audience at a battle of the bands competition, where the winner will perform for the renowned musician Ernesto de la Cruz. Héctor encourages Miguel, highlighting their shared goal of winning. A montage showcases various musical acts, creating an upbeat and festive atmosphere filled with excitement and anticipation. The EMCEE officially starts the competition, setting the stage for the performances to come.
Strengths
  • Engaging musical competition
  • Humorous interactions between characters
  • Clear progression of plot
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development beyond Héctor and Miguel
  • Low level of conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-executed, engaging, and sets up important plot points while maintaining a light-hearted and entertaining tone.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a musical competition to earn a chance to play for a famous musician is engaging and drives the plot forward effectively.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene through the introduction of the competition and the characters' motivations. It sets up future conflicts and resolutions.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and engaging concept of a battle of the bands competition, incorporating a diverse range of musical acts and performers. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters are well-developed, with Héctor and Miguel's relationship deepening as they work together towards a common goal.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the bond between Héctor and Miguel strengthens, setting the stage for potential growth.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to prove his musical talent and earn the opportunity to play for the renowned musician Ernesto de la Cruz. This reflects his deeper desire to pursue his passion for music and gain recognition for his talent.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to win the battle of the bands competition and secure a spot to perform at Ernesto de la Cruz's fiesta. This goal reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in the competition.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is relatively low but sets up potential conflicts for future developments.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the protagonist facing a competitive environment and diverse range of talented performers. The audience's reactions and the pressure to succeed create obstacles for the protagonist to overcome.

High Stakes: 7

The opportunity to play for Ernesto de la Cruz adds high stakes to the competition, driving the characters' actions and motivations.

Story Forward: 8

The scene propels the story forward by introducing key plot elements, raising the stakes, and setting up future events.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the diverse range of musical acts and performers, each bringing a unique style and energy to the competition. The audience's reactions and the outcome of the competition add an element of uncertainty and excitement.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between the protagonist's desire to pursue his passion for music and the challenges he faces in a competitive environment. This conflict challenges his beliefs in his own talent and determination.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of excitement, humor, and inspiration, resonating emotionally with the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is engaging and serves to move the scene forward while adding humor and depth to the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic and lively atmosphere, the diverse range of musical acts, and the protagonist's compelling goals and challenges. The audience's enthusiasm and the competition's stakes keep the reader invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and excitement, moving between the different musical acts and the protagonist's preparations backstage. The rhythm of the dialogue and action keeps the reader engaged and invested in the outcome of the competition.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the reader's understanding of the setting and atmosphere.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a competition or performance scene, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in building tension and excitement.


Critique
  • The scene effectively sets up the excitement of the battle of the bands competition, which is a pivotal moment for Miguel and Héctor. The EMCEE's enthusiastic introduction captures the audience's attention and establishes the stakes, making it clear that this is a significant opportunity for the characters.
  • The use of a quick montage to showcase various acts performing on stage is a creative way to convey the diversity of talent in the competition. However, the montage could benefit from more specific details about each act to enhance the visual storytelling and give the audience a clearer sense of the competition's atmosphere.
  • Héctor's elbowing Miguel and his comment about the competition being their ticket adds a nice touch of camaraderie and urgency to the scene. However, it might be more impactful if there were a brief moment of hesitation or doubt from Miguel, emphasizing the internal conflict he faces regarding his family's disapproval of music.
  • The pacing of the scene is brisk, which works well for the energy of a competition. However, it may be beneficial to slow down slightly after the montage to allow for character reactions and build anticipation for Miguel's performance. This could create a stronger emotional connection with the audience as they root for Miguel.
  • The scene lacks a clear emotional anchor for Miguel. While the excitement is palpable, it would enhance the scene to include a moment where Miguel reflects on what this opportunity means to him personally, perhaps through a brief internal monologue or a visual cue that highlights his determination.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a few lines of dialogue or a visual moment that showcases Miguel's internal conflict about participating in the competition, perhaps through a flashback or a brief conversation with Héctor.
  • Expand the montage by including a few more specific details about the acts, such as unique instruments or performance styles, to create a richer tapestry of the competition and engage the audience's imagination.
  • After the montage, allow for a moment of silence or a slow build-up to Miguel's performance, giving the audience time to absorb the excitement and tension of the competition.
  • Incorporate a visual or dialogue moment that highlights Miguel's personal stakes in the competition, reinforcing his passion for music and his desire to prove himself despite his family's disapproval.
  • Consider using the EMCEE's dialogue to foreshadow potential challenges or rivalries that Miguel might face during the competition, adding layers of tension and anticipation for the audience.



Scene 35 -  A Clash of Dreams
EXT. BACKSTAGE

Miguel and Héctor stand amongst other contestants.

HÉCTOR
So what's the plan? What are you
gonna play?

MIGUEL
Definitely "Remember Me."

Miguel plucks out the beginnings of de la Cruz’s most famous
song. Héctor clamps his hand over the fretboard.

HÉCTOR
No, not that one. No.




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MIGUEL
C'mon, it's his most popular song!

HÉCTOR
Ehck, it's too popular.

Elsewhere backstage, they notice multiple other acts
rehearsing their versions.

SKELETON MUSICIAN
(singing)
REMEMBER ME, THOUGH I HAVE TO TRAVEL FAR,
REMEMBER ME...

OPERA SINGERS
(singing)
REMEMBER ME!
DON'T LET IT MAKE YOU CRY!

One man plays water glasses to the famous tune. Héctor looks
at Miguel as if to ask, "Need I say more?"

MIGUEL
Um... what about “Poco Loco?”

HÉCTOR
Epa! Now that’s a song!

STAGEHAND
De la Cruzcito? You're on standby!
(to another band)
Los Chachalacos, you're up next!


ON STAGE

An impressive banda group steps onto stage.

CROWD
LOS CHACHALACOS!

They burst into a mighty introduction and the audience goes
wild. They're very good.


BACKSTAGE

Miguel peeks at the frenzied audience from backstage. He
looks sick and begins to pace, fidgety.

HÉCTOR
You always this nervous before a
performance?



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MIGUEL
I don't know -- I've never
performed before.

HÉCTOR
What?! You said you were a
musician!

MIGUEL
I am!
(beat)
I mean I will be. Once I win.

HÉCTOR
That's your plan?!
(beat)
No, no, no, no, no, you have to
win, Miguel. Your life LITERALLY
depends on you winning! AND YOU'VE
NEVER DONE THIS BEFORE?!

Héctor reaches for the guitar.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
I'll go up there--

Miguel recoils, keeping hold of the instrument.

MIGUEL
No! I need to do this.

HÉCTOR
Why?

MIGUEL
If I can't go out there and play
one song... how can I call myself a
musician?

HÉCTOR
What does that matter?!

MIGUEL
'Cuz I don't just want to get de la
Cruz's blessing. I need to prove
that... that I'm worthy of it.

HÉCTOR
Oh. Oh, that's such a sweet
sentiment... at SUCH a bad time!

Héctor looks in Miguel's eyes. The kid is sincere. Despite
himself, Héctor softens.



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HÉCTOR
Okay... okay, okay, okay. Okay.
Okay.
(beat)
Okay.
(beat)
Okay you wanna perform? Then
you’ve got to PERFORM!

Miguel perks, surprised that Héctor wants to help.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
First you have to loosen up. Shake
off those nerves! Sáquenlo
sáquenlo, sáquenlo!

Héctor does a loose-bone skeletal shimmy and Miguel copies.

HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
Now gimme your best grito!

MIGUEL
My best grito?

HÉCTOR
Come on, yell! Belt it out!
OOOOOOH HE-HE-HEY! Ha! Ah, feels
good! Okay... now you.

MIGUEL
(uncertain)
Ah -- ah -- ayyyyy yaaaaayyyyay...

Dante whimpers.

HÉCTOR
Oh, c'mon kid...

On stage, Los Chachalacos wrap up to raucous applause.

STAGEHAND
De la Cruzcito, you're on now!

HÉCTOR
Miguel, look at me.

STAGEHAND
Come on, let's go!

HÉCTOR
Hey! Hey, look at me.
(beat)
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HÉCTOR (CONT'D)
You can do this. Grab their
attention and don't let it go!

EMCEE (O.S.)
We have one more act, amigos!

MIGUEL
Héctor...

HÉCTOR
Make 'em listen, chamaco! You got
this!

EMCEE (O.S.)
Damas y caballeros! De la
Cruzcito!

The crowd applauds as Miguel is led on stage.

HÉCTOR
Arre papá! Hey!

Héctor's face contorts with a mix of encouragement and dread.


ON STAGE

Miguel slowly takes the stage, guitar in hand. He's blinded
by the lights and squints out at the audience. He's frozen
stiff.


OFF STAGE

HÉCTOR
(to Dante)
What's he doing? Why isn't he
playing?


ON STAGE

Panic is painted across Miguel's face.

AUDIENCE MEMBER (O.S.)
Bring back the singing dogs!

The crowd begins to murmur impatiently. Miguel looks to
Héctor in the wing.

Héctor makes eye contact with Miguel and does the "loosen up"
bone shimmy.




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On stage Miguel shakes off his nerves. Deep exhale and...

MIGUEL
HAAAAAAAI-YAAAAAAAAAAAI-YAAAAAAAAI!

The sound is full-throated and resonant. People in the
audience whistle and whoop. Some return the grito, some
applaud lightly. His brows go up and he begins his guitar
intro.

MIGUEL
(singing)
WHAT COLOR IS THE SKY?
AY MI AMOR, AY MI AMOR
YOU TELL ME THAT IT'S RED
AY MI AMOR, AY MI AMOR
WHERE SHOULD I PUT MY SHOES?
AY MI AMOR, AY MI AMOR
YOU SAY PUT THEM ON YOUR HEAD
AY MI AMOR, AY MI AMOR

As the audience warms up, so does Miguel. Héctor perks up,
he’s got this!

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
YOU MAKE ME UN POCO LOCO
UN POQUI-TI-TI-TO LOCO
THE WAY YOU KEEP ME GUESSING
I'M NODDING AND I'M YES-ING
I'LL COUNT IT AS A BLESSING
THAT I'M ONLY UN POCO LOCO...

INSTRUMENTAL INTERLUDE. Dante grabs Héctor by the leg and
drags him onto the stage with Miguel.

HÉCTOR
No, no, no, no...

Once in the spotlight, Héctor warms up and busts out some
percussive footwork to Miguel's guitar.

MIGUEL
Not bad for a dead guy!

HÉCTOR
You're not so bad yourself,
gordito! Eso!

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EDGE OF AUDIENCE

A ripple of glowing footprints leads Pepita and the Dead
Riveras to the edge of the audience.

MAMÁ IMELDA
He's close. Find him.

The Dead Riveras fan out through the audience.


ON STAGE

Héctor gets more creative with his dancing, head coming off,
limbs spinning around. The audience hoots!

HÉCTOR
(singing)
THE LOCO THAT YOU MAKE ME
IT IS JUST UN POCO CRAZY
THE SENSE THAT YOU'RE NOT MAKING...

MIGUEL
(singing)
THE LIBERTIES YOU'RE TAKING...

HECTOR MIGUEL
LEAVES MY CABEZA SHAKING LEAVES MY CABEZA SHAKING
YOU ARE JUST UN POCO LOCO YOU ARE JUST UN POCO LOCO

The audience starts clapping in time with the song. Dante
lets out a howl.

The Riveras continue their search in the audience.

TÍO FELIPE/TÍO OSCAR
We're looking for a living kid...
about 12?

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TÍA ROSITA
Have you seen a living boy?


ON STAGE

HECTOR MIGUEL
UN POQUI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI- UN POQUI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI-TI-
TI-TI-TO LOCO!! TI-TI-TO LOCO!!

The audience erupts into applause!




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Miguel smiles, soaking in the moment. He feels like a real
musician.

HÉCTOR
Hey, you did good! I'm proud of
you! Eso!

Miguel swells and looks back out the crowd when he suddenly
spots Oscar and Felipe talking to a stranger. He looks over
and there is Tía Rosita talking to someone else! Miguel
looks to stage right, where he sees Papá Julio talking to the
Emcee!

AUDIENCE
Otra! Otra! Otra!

Panicking, Miguel pulls Héctor off stage. Héctor tries to
pull back.


OFF STAGE

HÉCTOR
Hey, where are you going?

MIGUEL
We gotta get outta here.

HÉCTOR
What, are you crazy? We're about
to win this thing!


ON STAGE

The Emcee takes the microphone.

EMCEE
Damas y caballeros, I have an
emergency announcement.
(beat)
Please be on the lookout for a
living boy, answers to the name of
Miguel. Earlier tonight he ran
away from his family. They just
want to send him back to the Land
of the Living...

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OFF STAGE

EMCEE (O.S.)
...If anyone has information,
please contact the authorities.

HÉCTOR
Wait, wait, wait! You said de la
Cruz was your ONLY family. The
ONLY person who could send you
home.

MIGUEL
I do have other family, but--

HÉCTOR
You could have taken my photo back
this whole time?!

MIGUEL
--But they hate music! I need a
musician's blessing!

HÉCTOR
You lied to me!

MIGUEL
Oh, you're one to talk!

HÉCTOR
Look at me. I'm being forgotten,
Miguel. I don't even know if I'm
gonna last the night!
(beat)
I'm not gonna miss my one chance to
cross that bridge 'cause you want
to live out some stupid musical
fantasy!

MIGUEL
It's not stupid.

Héctor grabs Miguel's arm and pulls him toward the stage.

HÉCTOR
I'm taking you to your family.

MIGUEL
Let go of me!

HÉCTOR
You'll thank me later--




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Miguel yanks his arms away.

MIGUEL
You don't wanna help me, you only
care about yourself! Keep your
dumb photo!

He pulls Héctor's photo out of his pocket and throws it at
him. Héctor tries to grab it but it catches a breeze and
drifts into the crowd.

HÉCTOR
No -- no, no, no! No...

MIGUEL
Stay away from me!

As Héctor scrambles to catch his photo, Miguel runs away.
Héctor looks up but Miguel is gone.

HÉCTOR
Hey, chamaco! Where did you go?!
Chamaco! I'm sorry! Come back!
Genres: ["Musical","Drama","Comedy"]

Summary In a bustling backstage setting, Miguel prepares to perform at a music competition, expressing his desire to sing 'Remember Me.' Héctor, concerned about its popularity, encourages him to choose another song. As they witness other contestants rehearsing, Miguel's anxiety grows, but Héctor helps him find his confidence. Miguel ultimately takes the stage, starting off frozen but transitioning into an energetic rendition of 'Un Poco Loco' with Héctor. However, the mood shifts when an announcement reveals Miguel is missing, leading to a heated argument about their priorities. Frustrated, Miguel runs away, leaving Héctor scrambling to retrieve a photo he threw into the crowd.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Emotional depth
  • Engaging dialogue
  • High stakes
  • Musical performance
Weaknesses
  • Miguel's sudden decision to run away
  • Héctor's initial reluctance to help Miguel

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-written, engaging, and impactful, with strong character dynamics, emotional depth, and high stakes. The tension between Miguel and Héctor, the musical performance, and the revelation of family secrets all contribute to a compelling and memorable scene.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on the musical competition, family secrets, and emotional conflict, is well-developed and effectively executed. The scene effectively explores themes of family, identity, and the pursuit of dreams.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is engaging, with high stakes, emotional conflict, and significant character development. The revelation of family secrets and the tension between Miguel and Héctor drive the narrative forward and set up future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family, music, and personal identity, blending traditional Mexican culture with a contemporary coming-of-age story. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and relatable, adding depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene, particularly Miguel and Héctor, are well-developed and engaging. Their emotional conflict, growth, and interactions drive the scene and add depth to the story.

Character Changes: 8

Both Miguel and Héctor undergo significant changes in the scene, with Miguel confronting his family secrets and the true nature of his desires, while Héctor grapples with his own regrets and desires for redemption. Their interactions and conflicts drive their character development and set up future arcs.

Internal Goal: 9

Miguel's internal goal is to prove himself as a musician and earn de la Cruz's blessing. This reflects his deeper desire for validation and recognition of his talent, as well as his fear of failure and rejection.

External Goal: 8

Miguel's external goal is to win the talent show and secure de la Cruz's blessing to return to the Land of the Living. This goal reflects the immediate challenge he faces in the competition and the consequences of not winning.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is high, with emotional tension between Miguel and Héctor, the revelation of family secrets, and the high-stakes musical competition. The conflicting desires and motivations of the characters drive the narrative forward and create engaging drama.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting values and motivations driving the characters' actions and decisions. The audience is left uncertain of how the conflict will be resolved, adding tension and suspense to the narrative.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are high, with Miguel's future, Héctor's redemption, and the revelation of family secrets all hanging in the balance. The outcome of the musical competition and the characters' choices have significant consequences for the story.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward, with significant revelations, character development, and conflicts that set up future events and conflicts. The high-stakes competition, emotional dynamics, and family secrets all contribute to advancing the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' actions and decisions. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the conflict will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the importance of family and personal dreams. Héctor prioritizes Miguel's safety and family over his musical aspirations, while Miguel values his passion for music and desire for validation.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, with moments of tension, humor, regret, and determination. The interactions between Miguel and Héctor, the musical performance, and the revelation of family secrets all evoke strong emotions and add depth to the story.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is effective, with strong emotional beats, humor, and character dynamics. The interactions between Miguel and Héctor are particularly well-written and engaging.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dynamic characters, emotional depth, and high stakes. The conflict and tension keep the audience invested in the outcome, while the humor and cultural elements add richness to the narrative.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of tension, emotion, and action that keeps the story moving forward and maintains the audience's interest.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character dialogue, and stage directions that enhance the visual and emotional impact of the story.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a well-paced and engaging structure, building tension and conflict effectively while maintaining a clear focus on the characters' goals and motivations.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension and excitement as Miguel prepares for his performance, showcasing his internal conflict and desire to prove himself as a musician. However, the dialogue could be tightened to enhance the pacing and maintain the audience's engagement.
  • Héctor's character development shines through his interactions with Miguel, particularly in his initial reluctance to support Miguel's choice of song. This conflict adds depth to their relationship, but the transition from Héctor's skepticism to his encouragement could be more gradual to avoid feeling rushed.
  • The use of humor, particularly in Héctor's playful antics to help Miguel loosen up, adds a light-hearted tone that contrasts well with the underlying tension. However, some of the comedic moments could be more concise to keep the momentum of the scene flowing smoothly.
  • The stakes are clearly established with the announcement of Miguel's need for a musician's blessing, but the emotional weight of this moment could be amplified. Consider incorporating more of Miguel's thoughts or feelings about his family's disapproval of music to deepen the audience's connection to his struggle.
  • The climax of the scene, where Miguel finally takes the stage, is well-executed, but the transition from backstage to onstage could benefit from a more dramatic buildup. The audience's anticipation could be heightened with a more vivid description of Miguel's physical and emotional state as he steps into the spotlight.
Suggestions
  • Consider tightening the dialogue to enhance pacing, focusing on key emotional beats without unnecessary repetition.
  • Gradually transition Héctor's character from skepticism to support, perhaps by adding a moment of reflection where he recalls his own past performances.
  • Streamline comedic moments to maintain momentum, ensuring they serve the narrative rather than distract from it.
  • Deepen Miguel's emotional conflict by incorporating more of his internal thoughts about his family's disapproval of music, perhaps through brief voiceovers or inner monologues.
  • Enhance the transition from backstage to onstage by adding sensory details that capture Miguel's anxiety and excitement, such as the sounds of the audience or the brightness of the stage lights.



Scene 36 -  Frantic Escape in the Land of the Dead
EXT. PEDESTRIAN THOROUGHFARE

Miguel hustles to get away from Héctor. Dante bounds after
him, but looks back and whimpers. He barks to get Miguel's
attention.

MIGUEL
Dante, cállate!

But Dante is insistent. He tugs at Miguel's pants, pulling
him back to Héctor.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
No, Dante! Stop it! He can't help
me!

Dante grabs onto his hoodie sleeve. Miguel tries to shake
him off, but his hoodie slips off, revealing the arms of a
living boy. Dante redoubles his efforts.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
Dante, stop! Stop it! Leave me
alone! You're not a spirit guide,
you're just a dumb dog! Now get
out of here!

Miguel yanks his hoodie away from Dante, who shrinks back,
rebuffed. The scuffle has drawn the eyes of the crowd.



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Startled skeletons see Miguel's arms. He hurries to get his
hoodie back on.

CROWD MEMBERS
It's him! / It's that living boy! /
I heard about him. / Look! / He's
alive! / The boy's alive.

Miguel runs and jumps down some scaffolding. In the
distance, he sees de la Cruz's tower. After only a few
paces, Pepita lands in front of Miguel, cutting off his path!
He skids to a stop.

MIGUEL
AAHH!

Then, peeking over the jaguar's head is an even more
terrifying sight: Mamá Imelda riding atop.

MAMÁ IMELDA
This nonsense ends now, Miguel! I
am giving you my blessing and you
are going home!

MIGUEL
I don't want your blessing!

Miguel scrambles upright and bounds for a narrow alley
staircase.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel! Stop!

Not able to get through on her spirit guide, Imelda is forced
to pursue Miguel on foot.
Genres: ["Fantasy","Adventure","Musical"]

Summary In a bustling thoroughfare of the Land of the Dead, Miguel desperately tries to evade Héctor while his loyal dog, Dante, attempts to pull him back. As Miguel's hoodie slips off, revealing his living arms, a crowd of skeletons recognizes him, heightening the urgency of his escape. He encounters Mamá Imelda, who demands he accept her blessing and return home, but Miguel refuses and attempts to flee through a narrow alley staircase, pursued by both Mamá Imelda and the imposing jaguar, Pepita.
Strengths
  • Effective blend of tones and emotions
  • Compelling character development
  • Engaging plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Potential confusion with the introduction of the living boy element

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends different tones and sentiments, creating a compelling and engaging sequence that advances the plot and character development.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel navigating the Land of the Dead while trying to avoid his family and pursue his goal is engaging and well-developed.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with Miguel facing obstacles and making decisions that impact his journey and relationships with other characters.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of family and tradition, blending it with supernatural elements and a coming-of-age story. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the world depicted.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, particularly Miguel and Héctor, are well-developed and show growth and conflict in this scene. Their interactions are engaging and reveal more about their motivations and personalities.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant character development in this scene, showing defiance, determination, and growth as he navigates the challenges he faces.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to assert his independence and prove that he doesn't need the help of spirit guides or his family's blessing. This reflects his deeper need for autonomy and self-determination.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to evade his family and reach de la Cruz's tower. This reflects the immediate challenge of escaping the constraints placed on him by his family and pursuing his dream of becoming a musician.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Miguel and his family, as well as the internal conflict he faces in pursuing his dream, adds tension and emotional stakes to the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing obstacles from both his family and supernatural forces. The audience is left wondering how he will overcome these challenges and achieve his goals.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene as Miguel faces the possibility of being separated from his family and pursuing his dream against all odds.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new obstacles, deepening character relationships, and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected appearance of Mamá Imelda and the escalating tension between Miguel and his family. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the conflict will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is between tradition and individuality. Miguel's desire to pursue his passion for music clashes with his family's expectations and beliefs about the importance of tradition and family ties.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension and anxiety to humor and determination, making it emotionally impactful for the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension, humor, and emotion present in the scene. It also reveals important information about the characters and their relationships.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, fast-paced action, and emotional conflict. The reader is drawn into Miguel's struggle to assert his independence and pursue his dream.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense, keeping the reader engaged and invested in Miguel's journey. The rhythm of the action sequences adds excitement and urgency to the chase.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear action lines, dialogue, and scene descriptions. The visual elements are effectively conveyed to the reader.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the tension and excitement of the chase sequence.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the urgency and tension of Miguel's escape, showcasing his internal conflict between his desire for independence and the familial obligations imposed by Mamá Imelda. However, the emotional stakes could be heightened by deepening Miguel's internal struggle. Instead of simply rejecting Mamá Imelda's blessing, it would be beneficial to explore his feelings of guilt or fear about abandoning his family, which would add layers to his character.
  • Dante's role as a spirit guide is introduced but not fully realized in this scene. While he tries to pull Miguel back, the emotional weight of their bond could be emphasized further. Consider adding a moment where Miguel reflects on his relationship with Dante, perhaps recalling a past moment that highlights their connection, which would make Dante's actions more poignant.
  • The dialogue feels somewhat repetitive, particularly Miguel's insistence that Dante is 'just a dumb dog.' This could be streamlined to maintain the scene's pace while still conveying Miguel's frustration. Additionally, the crowd's reaction to Miguel being alive is a bit abrupt; it might benefit from a more gradual build-up to their realization, enhancing the tension and surprise.
  • The visual elements are strong, particularly the imagery of the scaffolding and the jaguar, Pepita. However, the transition from the crowd's realization to Mamá Imelda's entrance could be smoother. Consider using a visual cue or sound to bridge these moments, creating a more cohesive flow.
  • Mamá Imelda's character is established as authoritative, but her motivations could be clearer. Adding a line or two that hints at her past with music or her fears about Miguel's safety could provide depth to her character and make her pursuit of Miguel more relatable.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate a brief flashback or memory that Miguel has about his family or music to deepen his internal conflict and make his rejection of Mamá Imelda's blessing more impactful.
  • Enhance Dante's role by including a moment where Miguel acknowledges their bond, perhaps through a shared memory or a line that shows Miguel's affection for him, making Dante's actions feel more significant.
  • Streamline Miguel's dialogue to avoid repetition and maintain the scene's pace. Consider using more varied expressions of frustration to convey his emotional state.
  • Create a smoother transition between the crowd's realization and Mamá Imelda's entrance by using a visual or auditory cue, such as a gasp from the crowd or a sudden silence, to heighten the tension.
  • Add a line or two for Mamá Imelda that hints at her own fears or past experiences with music, which would provide context for her actions and make her character more relatable.



Scene 37 -  Chasing Dreams and Sacrifices
EXT. NARROW STAIRCASE

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
Come back! Miguel!

He wriggles through an iron gate.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
I am trying to save your life!

She is stopped by the gate.

MIGUEL
You're ruining my life!




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MAMÁ IMELDA
What?

MIGUEL
Music's the only thing that makes
me happy. And you, you wanna take
that away!
(beat)
You'll never understand.

Miguel heads away from her up the stairs.

MAMÁ IMELDA
(singing)
Y AUNQUE LA VIDA ME CUESTE,
LLORONA... NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE...

Miguel stops in his tracks. When Imelda finishes, he turns
back, confused.

MIGUEL
I thought you hated music.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Oh, I loved it.
(reminiscing)
I remember that feeling, when my
husband would play, and I would
sing and nothing else mattered.
But when we had Coco, suddenly...
there was something in my life that
mattered more than music. I wanted
to put down roots. He wanted to
play for the world.

Mamá Imelda pauses for a moment, lost in a memory.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
We each made a sacrifice to get
what we wanted. Now you must make
a choice.

MIGUEL
But I don't wanna... pick sides!
(beat)
Why can't you be on MY side?
That's what family's supposed to do
-- support you.
(beat)
But you never will.




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Miguel wipes the corner of his eye, frustrated. Imelda is
shocked to see him so hurt, but Miguel turns away before she
can answer and ascends the narrow staircase toward de la
Cruz's tower.
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical"]

Summary In this emotionally charged scene, Mamá Imelda chases after Miguel as he escapes through an iron gate, expressing her concern for his safety. Miguel argues that her opposition to his passion for music is ruining his life, leading to a revelation of Imelda's own past love for music and the sacrifices she made for family. This conflict highlights Miguel's feelings of isolation and frustration with his family's lack of support. As he ascends the staircase toward de la Cruz's tower, he turns away from Imelda, wiping away a tear, symbolizing his determination to pursue his dreams despite familial opposition.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Conflict resolution
Weaknesses
  • Potential predictability
  • Slightly melodramatic tone

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys the emotional turmoil and conflicting priorities faced by the characters, drawing the audience into the internal struggles of Miguel and Mamá Imelda.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring the tension between personal dreams and family obligations is compelling and relatable. The scene effectively delves into the complexities of familial relationships and the sacrifices made for loved ones.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in the scene focuses on the emotional conflict between Miguel and Mamá Imelda, adding depth to their characters and setting up future developments. The scene contributes to the overall narrative by highlighting key themes of family and sacrifice.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on the conflict between personal passion and family expectations, with authentic character actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Miguel and Mamá Imelda are well-developed, with their conflicting emotions and motivations effectively portrayed. The scene allows for significant character growth and exploration of their relationships.

Character Changes: 8

Both Miguel and Mamá Imelda undergo significant emotional changes in the scene, deepening their character arcs and setting up future developments. The conflict and resolution contribute to their growth and understanding.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to pursue his passion for music and feel supported by his family. This reflects his deeper need for validation and understanding of his desires.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to reach de la Cruz's tower, which reflects his immediate challenge of pursuing his dream despite familial opposition.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Miguel and Mamá Imelda is emotionally charged and drives the narrative forward, adding tension and depth to their interactions. The internal conflict faced by the characters enhances the dramatic impact of the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting desires and emotions between Miguel and Mamá Imelda creating a compelling conflict.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high in the scene as Miguel confronts his family about his passion for music and faces the dilemma of choosing between personal dreams and familial expectations. The emotional consequences of his decisions add depth to the narrative.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by developing the relationship between Miguel and Mamá Imelda, setting up future conflicts and resolutions. The emotional impact and character growth contribute to the overall narrative progression.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the shifting dynamics between Miguel and Mamá Imelda, keeping the audience unsure of the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict is between pursuing personal passion and family expectations. It challenges Miguel's beliefs about family support and understanding.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions of sadness, frustration, and empathy, drawing the audience into the internal struggles of the characters. The emotional depth and complexity of the scene resonate with viewers.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the emotional turmoil and conflicting perspectives of the characters, adding depth to their interactions and motivations. The conversations between Miguel and Mamá Imelda drive the emotional core of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional conflict between the characters and the high stakes of Miguel's pursuit of his passion.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional impact, leading to a climactic moment of choice for the protagonist.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character motivations and progression of conflict.


Critique
  • The emotional stakes in this scene are high, as it captures a pivotal moment between Miguel and Mamá Imelda. The conflict of passion versus family duty is well-established, but the dialogue could be more dynamic. Miguel's lines feel somewhat one-note in their frustration, and while his emotions are valid, adding more layers to his argument could enhance the tension.
  • Mamá Imelda's revelation about her past love for music adds depth to her character, but the transition from her chasing Miguel to reminiscing about her husband feels abrupt. A smoother transition could help maintain the emotional flow and prevent the scene from feeling disjointed.
  • The use of song as a means to connect with Miguel is a powerful choice, but it could be more impactful if the lyrics or melody were referenced in a way that resonates with Miguel's current feelings. This would create a stronger emotional bridge between their experiences.
  • The setting of the narrow staircase is effective in creating a physical barrier between the characters, symbolizing their emotional distance. However, the visual description could be enhanced to reflect the tension of the moment. For example, describing the atmosphere or the sounds of the Land of the Dead could add to the urgency of the scene.
  • Miguel's emotional response is relatable, but the moment where he wipes the corner of his eye could be more visually expressive. Instead of just stating he is frustrated, showing physical manifestations of his emotions (like clenching his fists or pacing) could make his struggle more palpable.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more complexity to Miguel's argument about music. Perhaps he could reference specific memories or feelings associated with music that highlight its importance in his life, making his plea more compelling.
  • Smooth out the transition from Mamá Imelda's pursuit to her reminiscing by incorporating a brief moment of hesitation or conflict within her, showing her internal struggle between her past and her current role as a protector.
  • Incorporate a specific line or theme from the song Mamá Imelda sings that directly relates to Miguel's situation, reinforcing the emotional connection and making the moment more poignant.
  • Enhance the visual elements of the staircase setting by describing the environment in more detail, such as the sounds of the bustling plaza below or the eerie quiet of the staircase, to heighten the tension and urgency.
  • Make Miguel's emotional response more dynamic by showing his physical reactions to his feelings, which can help the audience connect with his internal struggle and make the scene more visually engaging.



Scene 38 -  Miguel's Sneaky Ascent
EXT. BOTTOM OF THE TOWER

Miguel arrives at the foot of the hill to de la Cruz's tower.

Vehicles from all eras (limousines, motor cars, carriages)
drop off finely dressed guests who line up to get aboard a
funicular that scales the tower to the mansion.

A couple at the front of the line show a fancy invitation to
a SECURITY GUARD, who then lets them onto the funicular.

SECURITY GUARD
Have a good time.

GUEST
Oh, how exciting!

EL SANTO, the silver-masked luchador, produces a fancy
invitation to the security guard.

SECURITY GUARD
Oh! El Santo!
(giddy)
I'm a big fan.

The security guard sheepishly holds up a camera.

SECURITY GUARD
You mind if I--

El Santo nods. The security guard removes his head and hands
it to the luchador for a selfie. His body proceeds to take
the photo.

SECURITY GUARD
Gracias, señor!

The security guard puts his head back on and El Santo heads
past the velvet rope. Miguel is revealed waiting in line
behind him.

SECURITY GUARD
Invitation?

MIGUEL
It's okay. I'm Ernesto's great-
great grandson!



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Miguel strikes de la Cruz's signature pose with his guitar.

CUT TO:

Miguel is tossed out of the line. Just then he sees Los
Chachalacos unloading their instruments from their van. He
runs up to them.

MIGUEL
Disculpen, señores...

BAND LEADER
Hey guys, it's Poco Loco!

BAND MEMBER #2
You were on fire tonight!

MIGUEL
You too! Hey, musician to
musician, I need a favor...

CUT TO:

The Band Leader hands an invitation to the security guard.

SECURITY GUARD
Ooo, the competition winners!
Congratulations chicos!

Los Chachalacos file onto the funicular, the sousaphone
player angling his instrument away from the security guard.
After they get onto the funicular, he turns to reveal a pair
of legs hanging out of the bell of the sousaphone. With a
deep “TOOT!” Miguel spills out onto the floor of the
funicular.

MIGUEL
Thanks guys!

The funicular ascends.
Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Comedy"]

Summary At the base of de la Cruz's tower, Miguel tries to board a funicular but is denied entry. He witnesses the famous luchador El Santo taking a selfie with a starstruck security guard. Seeking help, Miguel approaches the band Los Chachalacos, who provide him with an invitation for the guard. To sneak aboard, Miguel cleverly hides inside a sousaphone, only to be humorously ejected onto the funicular floor as it ascends towards the mansion.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Strong character development
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some predictable elements
  • Slight lack of originality in certain scenes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted with a good balance of humor, emotion, and excitement. It effectively sets up the stakes for Miguel and introduces key characters and conflicts.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel trying to access de la Cruz's tower and the competition adds depth to the story. The scene effectively explores themes of family, music, and ambition.

Plot: 8

The plot is engaging and moves forward with the introduction of new challenges and conflicts. The scene sets up important events and character motivations.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the classic 'fish out of water' scenario, blending elements of comedy, music, and family dynamics in a unique and engaging way.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their interactions drive the scene forward. Miguel, Mamá Imelda, and El Santo stand out with their distinct personalities and motivations.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel experiences growth and conflict in the scene, particularly in his interactions with Mamá Imelda. His determination and passion are tested, leading to character development.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to gain access to the mansion despite not having an invitation. This reflects his desire to connect with his family history and pursue his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to gain entry to the mansion to pursue his dream of becoming a musician and uncovering the truth about his family history.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Miguel and Mamá Imelda adds tension and emotional depth to the scene. The competition and Miguel's desire to access the tower raise the stakes.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing challenges and setbacks in his attempts to gain entry to the mansion.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high as Miguel tries to access de la Cruz's tower and compete in the music competition. The emotional conflicts and personal ambitions raise the stakes for the characters.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new challenges, conflicts, and motivations for the characters. It sets up important events and character arcs.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in Miguel's interactions with the security guard and the band members.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of family, tradition, and pursuing one's dreams. Miguel's desire to connect with his family's musical legacy clashes with the exclusivity and elitism of the mansion's guests.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, particularly in the conflict between Miguel and Mamá Imelda. The themes of family and ambition resonate with the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is engaging and serves to reveal character traits and advance the plot. The humor and emotional depth in the conversations enhance the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, heart, and suspense as Miguel navigates the challenges of gaining entry to the mansion.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense as Miguel faces obstacles in his quest to gain entry to the mansion.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, dialogue formatting, and action lines.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character motivations, conflict, and progression of the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the excitement and grandeur of de la Cruz's tower, showcasing the vibrant atmosphere with finely dressed guests and the funicular. However, it could benefit from deeper character exploration, particularly Miguel's emotional state as he transitions from the previous scene's frustration to this moment of anticipation.
  • The introduction of El Santo adds a fun and recognizable element, but the scene could further emphasize Miguel's feelings of inadequacy and determination. While he attempts to assert his identity as de la Cruz's great-great-grandson, the lack of internal conflict or reflection makes his actions feel somewhat superficial.
  • The comedic moment with the security guard and El Santo is entertaining, but it slightly detracts from the urgency of Miguel's quest. Balancing humor with the stakes of Miguel's journey is crucial to maintain tension and keep the audience invested in his success.
  • The transition from Miguel's emotional turmoil to the lighthearted interactions with Los Chachalacos feels abrupt. A smoother transition that reflects Miguel's internal struggle while also showcasing his determination to pursue his dreams would enhance the scene's emotional depth.
  • The visual elements, such as the funicular and the various vehicles, are vivid and engaging, but the scene could benefit from more sensory details that evoke the atmosphere of the moment. Describing sounds, smells, or the energy of the crowd could immerse the audience further into the setting.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate Miguel's internal thoughts or feelings as he arrives at the tower to provide insight into his emotional state and motivations. This could be done through voiceover or brief moments of reflection.
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel interacts with a guest or another character in line, allowing him to express his determination or frustration more directly, which would help build empathy for his character.
  • Maintain the comedic elements but ensure they serve to highlight Miguel's journey rather than distract from it. Perhaps the humor could come from Miguel's cleverness or resourcefulness in navigating the situation.
  • Create a more gradual transition between the emotional weight of the previous scene and the lighter tone of this one. This could involve a brief moment of hesitation or doubt from Miguel before he engages with the band.
  • Enhance the sensory details in the scene to create a more immersive experience. Describe the sounds of the funicular, the chatter of the guests, or the vibrant colors of the setting to draw the audience into the moment.



Scene 39 -  A Night of Wonder at de la Cruz's Mansion
EXT. DE LA CRUZ'S MANSION

The doors of the funicular open to reveal de la Cruz's lavish
mansion. Los Chachalacos all file out.

MIGUEL
Whoa...

BAND LEADER
Enjoy the party, little músico!




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MIGUEL
Gracias!

Miguel heads off toward the mansion.

On the stairs leading up, the party is bustling --
performers, servers and guests dressed to the nines.

A fire breather lets out flames that transform into a flurry
of butterflies.

GUEST
Look, it's Ernesto!

Miguel catches a glimpse of de la Cruz heading deeper into
the party. Miguel pursues.

MIGUEL
De la Cruz...
Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Musical"]

Summary Miguel and the Los Chachalacos arrive at the extravagant mansion of Ernesto de la Cruz, where he is mesmerized by the opulent party filled with performers and elegantly dressed guests. As he witnesses a fire breather creating butterflies from flames, the excitement builds with the announcement of de la Cruz's arrival. Encouraged by the Band Leader, Miguel expresses his awe and determination to find his idol, setting off deeper into the vibrant celebration.
Strengths
  • Engaging character dynamics
  • Vibrant setting and visuals
  • Emotional depth and conflict resolution
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Character development could be further explored

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines elements of excitement, conflict, and emotional depth, moving the story forward while engaging the audience with its vibrant setting and character dynamics.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel's quest to meet de la Cruz, intertwined with family conflict and emotional depth, is compelling and drives the scene forward with purpose.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging, with multiple layers of conflict and resolution that propel the story forward while deepening character relationships and motivations.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh approach to depicting a luxurious party setting with magical elements, adding authenticity to the characters' actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their interactions drive the emotional and narrative arcs of the scene, adding depth and complexity to the story.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes some character development as he confronts his family and pursues his passion, but there is room for further growth and transformation.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to meet de la Cruz, his idol, and seek his approval and recognition for his musical talents. This reflects Miguel's deeper need for validation and acceptance of his passion for music.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to navigate the party and find de la Cruz to fulfill his internal goal of meeting him.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The scene features multiple levels of conflict, including internal struggles, familial tensions, and external obstacles, creating a dynamic and engaging narrative.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong as Miguel faces the challenge of finding de la Cruz in a bustling party, creating uncertainty and obstacles for the protagonist.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high for Miguel as he navigates familial expectations, personal desires, and external challenges in his quest to meet de la Cruz, adding tension and urgency to the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up future plot developments, driving the narrative towards its climax.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because the audience is unsure of how Miguel's meeting with de la Cruz will unfold, adding tension and intrigue to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between Miguel's desire for recognition and acceptance from de la Cruz, and the potential reality of de la Cruz not living up to Miguel's expectations or values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from excitement and anticipation to tension and empathy, drawing the audience into the characters' struggles and motivations.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is engaging and serves to reveal character motivations and conflicts, though some moments could be more impactful or memorable.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it immerses the audience in the luxurious and magical world of de la Cruz's mansion, building anticipation for Miguel's encounter with his idol.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and excitement as Miguel navigates the party to find de la Cruz, keeping the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, enhancing the readability and flow of the narrative.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively setting up the protagonist's goals and introducing the conflict.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's awe and excitement as he arrives at de la Cruz's mansion, which is essential for establishing the grandeur of the setting. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic to reflect Miguel's emotional state. Instead of a simple 'Whoa...' it might be more impactful if Miguel expressed his feelings about the mansion's opulence in a more vivid way, perhaps by describing what he sees or how it makes him feel.
  • The introduction of the fire breather is visually striking and adds to the festive atmosphere, but it could be enhanced by including Miguel's reaction to this spectacle. This would deepen the audience's connection to Miguel's character and his passion for music and performance.
  • The transition from the funicular to the mansion feels a bit abrupt. A brief moment of Miguel taking in the surroundings before he heads off could help to ground the scene and give the audience a moment to absorb the grandeur of the mansion.
  • The dialogue from the band leader, 'Enjoy the party, little músico!' is friendly but lacks depth. It could be an opportunity to reinforce Miguel's aspirations or fears about being in such a high-profile environment. Perhaps the band leader could offer a piece of advice or a warning that reflects the stakes of Miguel's journey.
  • The scene ends with Miguel pursuing de la Cruz, which is a strong narrative choice. However, it might benefit from a more explicit indication of Miguel's determination or urgency. Adding a line that reflects his internal thoughts or motivations could enhance the emotional weight of this moment.
Suggestions
  • Revise Miguel's initial reaction to the mansion to include more descriptive language that conveys his awe and excitement.
  • Incorporate a moment where Miguel reacts to the fire breather, showcasing his wonder and connection to the performance aspect of the party.
  • Add a brief pause or moment of reflection for Miguel as he steps out of the funicular, allowing the audience to fully appreciate the setting before he moves on.
  • Enhance the band leader's dialogue to include a piece of advice or a comment that resonates with Miguel's journey, adding depth to their interaction.
  • Consider adding a line that reflects Miguel's internal thoughts or feelings as he pursues de la Cruz, emphasizing his determination and the stakes involved.



Scene 40 -  A Grand Revelation
INT. DE LA CRUZ’S MANSION

Miguel heads into the foyer but loses de la Cruz in the
crowd.

MIGUEL
Señor de la Cruz!

Miguel elbows his way through the room.

MIGUEL
Pardon me, Señor de la Cruz! Señor
de la--

He finds himself in a huge hall with hundreds of guests, the
heart of the party. Film clips play all around the room from
de la Cruz's movies.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
When you see your moment, you
mustn't let it pass you by. You
must seize it.

Miguel takes it all in. Synchronized swimmers make
formations in a sparkling indoor pool. A DJ lays a decades-
spanning mash-up soundtrack.

A clip of de la Cruz riding his noble steed plays behind
Miguel.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
We're almost there, Dante.



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Miguel jumps to see above the crowd.

MIGUEL
Señor de la Cruz! Señor de la--

Miguel is unable to get his great-great grandfather’s
attention. Meanwhile, a clip behind Miguel features de la
Cruz as a good-natured priest:

NUN (FILM CLIP)
But what can we do? It is
hopeless...

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
You must have faith, sister.

NUN (FILM CLIP)
Oh but Padre, he will never listen.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
He will listen... to MUSIC!

The passionate words embolden Miguel. He climbs a pillar to
the landing of a grand staircase, he stands above the crowd.

Miguel takes a breath and throws out a grito as loud as he
can. It echoes through the space, and party guests turn.
The DJ fades the music.

Garnering some attention, Miguel plays his guitar. More
guests turn.

As a hush falls on the crowd, the sound of Miguel's guitar
becomes singular.

MIGUEL
(singing)
SEÑORAS Y SEÑORES
BUENAS TARDES, BUENAS NOCHES
BUENAS TARDES, BUENAS NOCHES
SEÑORITAS Y SEÑORES
TO BE HERE WITH YOU TONIGHT
BRINGS ME JOY! ¡QUÉ ALEGRÍA!
FOR THIS MUSIC IS MY LANGUAGE
AND THE WORLD ES MI FAMILIA

Miguel continues to play and sing as he nervously walks
forward; the crowd parting, he moves closer to DLC.

MIGUEL
FOR THIS MUSIC IS MY LANGUAGE
AND THE WORLD ES MI FAMILIA




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He passes a movie screen where a clip features de la Cruz
singing the same song in one of his films, the songs
overlapping for a brief moment.

MIGUEL & DE LA CRUZ
FOR THIS MUSIC IS MY LANGUAGE
AND THE WORLD ES MI FAMILIA

Miguel's soul pours into the strings as he approaches his
hero--

MIGUEL
FOR THIS MUSIC IS MY LANG--

SPLASH! Miguel tumbles into the indoor pool.

The party-goers gasp, but it's Ernesto who rolls up his
sleeves, and, in true movie hero fashion, jumps into the pool
and lifts a coughing Miguel to the edge.

DE LA CRUZ
Are you all right, niño?

Miguel looks up, mortified. His painted face begins to run,
revealing him to be a living boy. De la Cruz's eyes go wide.
The crowd gasps and murmurs.

DE LA CRUZ
It's you... you, you are that boy,
the one who came from the Land of
the Living.

MIGUEL
You... know about me?

DE LA CRUZ
You are all anyone has been talking
about! Why have you come here?

MIGUEL
I'm Miguel. Your great-great
grandson.

More murmuring from the crowd. De la Cruz is shocked.

DE LA CRUZ
I... have a great-great grandson?

MIGUEL
I need your blessing. So I can go
back home and be a musician, just
like you.
(beat)
(MORE)

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MIGUEL (CONT'D)
The rest of our family, they
wouldn't listen. But I... I hoped
you would?

DE LA CRUZ
My boy, with a talent like yours,
how could I not listen?

Miguel hugs de la Cruz who sweeps Miguel up onto his
shoulders, showing him off to the room.

DE LA CRUZ
I HAVE A GREAT-GREAT GRANDSON!

The crowd roars.

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Genres: ["Musical","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary At de la Cruz's lavish party, Miguel desperately seeks his great-great grandfather's attention. He climbs a pillar to sing a heartfelt song, but accidentally falls into a pool. De la Cruz saves him and, upon learning Miguel's identity, joyfully grants his blessing to pursue music. The scene culminates in a celebratory moment as de la Cruz proudly introduces Miguel to the crowd.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Plot progression
  • Musical performance
Weaknesses
  • Predictability in some moments
  • Slight clichés in character interactions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, engaging, and emotionally impactful, with a significant plot development and character interaction that keeps the audience invested.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Miguel seeking de la Cruz's blessing and the subsequent reveal of their relationship is compelling and drives the narrative forward. The scene effectively explores themes of family, music, and identity.

Plot: 9

The plot in this scene is crucial as it reveals Miguel's connection to de la Cruz, sets up future conflicts and resolutions, and propels the story towards its resolution. The stakes are high, and the tension is palpable.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the theme of pursuing one's passion, blending elements of music, family, and legacy in a unique and engaging way. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters, especially Miguel and de la Cruz, are well-developed and their interactions are emotionally resonant. The scene showcases their growth, motivations, and relationships effectively.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant character growth in the scene, from seeking validation from de la Cruz to asserting his own identity and aspirations. The scene marks a turning point in Miguel's journey.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal is to seek validation and approval from his idol, de la Cruz, in pursuing his passion for music. This reflects his deeper desire for acceptance and recognition of his talent.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to receive de la Cruz's blessing to pursue his dream of becoming a musician. This goal reflects the immediate challenge he faces in convincing his idol to support him.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, as Miguel grapples with his identity, family expectations, and musical aspirations. The tension between Miguel and de la Cruz adds depth to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Miguel facing challenges in gaining de la Cruz's approval and overcoming his family's disapproval. The uncertainty of the outcome adds tension and suspense to the scene.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene as Miguel seeks de la Cruz's blessing to pursue his musical dreams. The revelation of Miguel's identity adds complexity and raises the emotional stakes.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing Miguel's connection to de la Cruz, setting up future conflicts and resolutions, and deepening character relationships. It advances the narrative in a meaningful way.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in Miguel's unexpected fall into the pool and the revelation of his true identity, adding a surprising twist to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of family, legacy, and following one's passion. Miguel's belief in the power of music clashes with his family's disapproval, highlighting the importance of pursuing one's dreams despite opposition.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, eliciting feelings of hope, joy, shock, and empathy from the audience. Miguel's journey and the revelation of his identity resonate on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is impactful, revealing character emotions, motivations, and conflicts. It effectively conveys the themes of family, music, and identity, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, musical elements, and character development. The tension, humor, and heartwarming moments keep the audience invested in Miguel's journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension, emotion, and momentum, leading to a climactic moment of revelation and resolution.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a well-paced structure that builds tension, emotion, and resolution effectively, fitting the expected format for its genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Miguel's desperation and excitement as he seeks out de la Cruz, which aligns well with the overall theme of pursuing one's dreams. However, the transition from the chaotic party atmosphere to Miguel's focused pursuit could be smoother. The initial chaos is engaging, but it might benefit from a clearer visual or auditory cue that signifies Miguel's determination to find de la Cruz amidst the distractions.
  • The use of film clips featuring de la Cruz adds a layer of depth to the scene, showcasing his larger-than-life persona. However, the dialogue from the clips could be more tightly integrated with Miguel's actions. For instance, the line 'You must have faith, sister' could be echoed in Miguel's internal thoughts or actions, reinforcing his own struggle with faith in his musical aspirations.
  • Miguel's climb to the pillar is a strong visual moment, symbolizing his desire to rise above the obstacles in his path. However, the moment could be enhanced by adding a brief internal monologue or reflection from Miguel as he climbs, emphasizing his emotional stakes and the significance of this moment in his journey.
  • The moment when Miguel falls into the pool serves as a comedic relief, but it also detracts from the emotional weight of his performance. While humor is essential, it might be more impactful if the fall were less abrupt, allowing for a moment of connection between Miguel and the audience before the splash. This could heighten the tension and anticipation of his performance.
  • The dialogue between Miguel and de la Cruz is pivotal, but it could benefit from more emotional resonance. Miguel's plea for a blessing feels somewhat rushed; adding a moment of vulnerability where Miguel expresses his fears or doubts about returning home could deepen the audience's connection to his character and heighten the stakes.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Miguel reflects on his journey and the significance of finding de la Cruz before he climbs the pillar. This could enhance the emotional stakes and provide insight into his character's motivations.
  • Integrate the film clips more seamlessly with Miguel's actions. For example, have Miguel react to specific lines from the clips that resonate with his own struggles, creating a stronger thematic connection.
  • Modify the fall into the pool to allow for a brief moment of connection between Miguel and the audience before the comedic interruption. This could involve a lingering shot of Miguel's performance or a moment of silence from the crowd before the splash.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Miguel and de la Cruz by allowing Miguel to express his fears about pursuing music and the family's disapproval. This could create a more poignant moment that resonates with the audience.
  • Ensure that the crowd's reactions are varied and dynamic, reflecting the range of emotions present at the party. This could include moments of surprise, laughter, and concern, which would add depth to the scene and enhance the overall atmosphere.



Scene 41 -  A Joyous Introduction
EXT. BOTTOM OF THE TOWER

CROWD
Look, it's Frida!

The silhouette of Frida Kahlo steps up to the security guard.

HÉCTOR
Yes, it is I. Frida Kahlo.

The security guard lets her in immediately. No need to check
the list.

SECURITY GUARD
It is an honor, señora!

HÉCTOR
Gracias...

Hector steps onto the funicular, readjusting his unibrow to
maintain his diguise.

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EXT. DE LA CRUZ’S MANSION

Quick cuts over instrumental version of "Remember Me:"

De la Cruz barges into several conversations, proudly
introducing Miguel. He seems almost giddy. They wedge
themselves into a group laughing in the garden (which
includes Jorge Negrete & Pedro Infante):




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DE LA CRUZ
Hey Negrete! Infante! Have you
met my great-great-grandson?

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De la Cruz and Miguel ride up on horseback while guests play
polo:

DE LA CRUZ
My great-great grandson!

CUT TO:

In the parlor:

DE LA CRUZ
He's alive! And a musician to
boot!

CUT TO:

Miguel chats away with de la Cruz and guests.

MIGUEL
Dimple. No dimple. Dimple. No
dimple.

De la Cruz laughs, delighted.

DE LA CRUZ
No dimple!

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A film clip is projected in the main hall.

ON SCREEN: Don Hidalgo turns raising two glasses. Miguel
acts along with the clip.

DON HIDALGO (FILM CLIP)
To our friendship!...

DON HIDALGO (FILM CLIP) MIGUEL
...I would move Heaven and ...I would move Heaven and
Earth for you, mi amigo. Earth for you, mi amigo.
Salud! Salud!

In the clip Don Hidalgo and de la Cruz drink. De la Cruz
spits.

MIGUEL DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
Poison! Poison!



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Miguel and de la Cruz gleefully act out the ensuing fist
fight.

DE LA CRUZ
You know, I did all my own stunts.

CUT TO:

A small crowd sways, arms around shoulders, as Miguel and
Ernesto lead them in a chorus of "Remember Me."
Genres: ["Musical","Comedy","Fantasy"]

Summary Frida Kahlo arrives at a tower and is recognized by the security guard, allowing her entry. Meanwhile, De la Cruz proudly showcases his great-great-grandson, Miguel, to guests at his mansion during a lively gathering. Miguel charms everyone with his musical talent and humor, engaging in a reenactment of a film clip and leading a sing-along of 'Remember Me.' The scene is filled with celebratory interactions, highlighting the joy and pride of family connections.
Strengths
  • Vibrant atmosphere
  • Engaging musical performances
  • Humorous interactions between characters
Weaknesses
  • Minimal conflict
  • Focus on celebration over plot progression

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, engaging, and full of energy, capturing the essence of a grand celebration with musical performances and comedic interactions.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a grand celebration at de la Cruz's mansion is well-executed, incorporating musical performances, comedic elements, and fantasy interactions to create a lively and entertaining scene.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene revolves around Miguel's encounter with de la Cruz at the grand party, leading to a significant moment of revelation and celebration. While the plot progression is engaging, the focus is more on the interactions and atmosphere of the party.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of identity and deception, blending historical and fantastical elements in a unique way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging, adding to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene, especially Miguel and de la Cruz, are well-developed and engaging, with distinct personalities and motivations. Their interactions add depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 7

Miguel undergoes a significant change in the scene as he discovers his connection to de la Cruz and receives his blessing to pursue music. This moment marks a turning point in Miguel's journey of self-discovery.

Internal Goal: 8

Hector's internal goal in this scene is to maintain his disguise as Frida Kahlo and navigate the social interactions at De la Cruz's mansion without blowing his cover. This reflects his fear of being discovered and the consequences that may follow.

External Goal: 7

Hector's external goal is to gather information or achieve a specific objective related to his mission at De la Cruz's mansion. This goal is driven by the immediate circumstances and challenges he faces in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The conflict in the scene is minimal, focusing more on the celebration and interactions between characters. The tension arises from Miguel's pursuit of his musical dreams and his encounter with de la Cruz.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene adds a layer of challenge and uncertainty to Hector's mission, keeping the audience on their toes and invested in the outcome.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in the scene, as Miguel seeks de la Cruz's blessing to pursue music and faces challenges in navigating the grand party. The outcome of this encounter has significant implications for Miguel's future.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by revealing key information about Miguel's heritage and passion for music. It sets the stage for future developments in Miguel's journey and relationships.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' interactions and the unfolding of Hector's mission at the mansion.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around identity and deception. Hector's need to maintain his disguise as Frida Kahlo challenges his sense of self and authenticity, as well as the moral implications of his actions.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a high emotional impact, with moments of joy, revelation, and celebration that resonate with the audience. The interactions between characters and the musical performances evoke strong emotions.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene is lively and engaging, with humorous exchanges and meaningful conversations between characters. It adds to the overall tone and atmosphere of the grand celebration.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mix of humor, drama, and musical elements, as well as the tension of Hector's disguise and the unfolding events at De la Cruz's mansion.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, as well as allowing for moments of humor and emotional depth to shine through.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is well-executed, with clear scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions and pacing that keep the narrative flowing smoothly.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the excitement and joy of Miguel's introduction to the world of de la Cruz, showcasing the contrast between Miguel's humble beginnings and the opulence of the mansion. However, the pacing feels rushed due to the quick cuts, which may detract from the emotional weight of Miguel's experience. Each moment could benefit from a bit more time to breathe, allowing the audience to fully absorb Miguel's awe and the significance of his surroundings.
  • The dialogue is playful and engaging, particularly Miguel's humorous banter about his dimple. However, the scene could benefit from deeper emotional resonance. While the humor is enjoyable, it might overshadow the gravity of Miguel's journey and his connection to de la Cruz. Balancing humor with moments of introspection could enhance the scene's emotional depth.
  • The use of quick cuts is visually dynamic but may lead to confusion about the timeline of events. It would be helpful to establish clearer transitions between the different settings and interactions to maintain coherence. For instance, a brief establishing shot of the mansion before diving into the quick cuts could ground the audience in the setting.
  • The character of de la Cruz is portrayed as charismatic and larger-than-life, which is effective in showcasing his celebrity status. However, it might be beneficial to hint at his more complex nature, foreshadowing the darker aspects of his character that will be revealed later. This could create a more layered portrayal and build tension as Miguel's admiration for him grows.
  • The scene culminates in a sing-along of 'Remember Me,' which is a fitting choice given its thematic significance. However, the transition into this moment feels abrupt. A more gradual build-up to the sing-along, perhaps through Miguel's internal thoughts or a shared moment of connection with de la Cruz, could enhance the emotional payoff.
Suggestions
  • Consider slowing down the pacing of the scene to allow for more character development and emotional resonance. Give Miguel moments to reflect on his surroundings and the significance of meeting de la Cruz.
  • Incorporate more introspective dialogue or internal monologue from Miguel to balance the humor with deeper emotional stakes. This could help the audience connect more with his journey and aspirations.
  • Clarify the transitions between quick cuts by using establishing shots or visual cues that ground the audience in the setting. This will help maintain coherence and enhance the overall flow of the scene.
  • Introduce subtle hints about de la Cruz's darker nature earlier in the scene to create a more complex character. This foreshadowing can build tension and intrigue as Miguel's admiration for him grows.
  • Create a smoother transition into the sing-along by building up to it through shared experiences or emotional connections between Miguel and de la Cruz, enhancing the impact of this moment.



Scene 42 -  A Melody of Sacrifice
INT. DE LA CRUZ’S OFRENDA ROOM

De la Cruz gestures to the massive piles of gifts from his
fans: bread, fruits, flowers, instruments, etc. All piled up
to the ceiling.

DE LA CRUZ
All of this came from my amazing
fans in the Land of the Living!
They leave me more offerings than I
know what to do with!

Miguel takes in the room, it's almost too much to absorb.
Something seems to be on the boy's mind.

DE LA CRUZ
Hey, what's wrong? Is it too much?
You look overwhelmed...

MIGUEL
No -- it's all great.

DE LA CRUZ
But...?

MIGUEL
It's just -- I've been looking up
to you my whole life. You're the
guy who actually did it! But...
(beat)
Did you ever regret it? Choosing
music over... everything else.

De la Cruz kneels down and looks into Miguel's eyes.

DE LA CRUZ
It was hard. Saying goodbye to my
hometown. Heading off on my own...

MIGUEL
Leaving your family?



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DE LA CRUZ
Sí. But I could not have done it
differently.
(beat)
One cannot deny who one is meant to
be. And you, my great-great
grandson, are meant to be a
musician!

Miguel smiles, chest swelling. He feels validated for the
first time in his life.

DE LA CRUZ (CONT’D)
You and I, we are artists, Miguel!
We cannot belong to one family.
The world is our family!

De la Cruz gestures to the sparkling city beyond his hilltop
estate. Fireworks go off on the veranda.

DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
Ooo, the fireworks have begun!

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Genres: ["Musical","Family","Drama"]

Summary In De la Cruz's ofrenda room during the Day of the Dead celebrations, Miguel feels overwhelmed by the gifts from fans. He admires De la Cruz but questions him about the sacrifices made for music over family. De la Cruz reflects on his own past, affirming that while it was difficult to leave his family, he has no regrets and encourages Miguel to pursue his musical dreams. The scene concludes with De la Cruz pointing out the fireworks outside, symbolizing celebration and artistic joy.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Musical integration
Weaknesses
  • Limited external conflict
  • Predictable outcome

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene effectively conveys a sense of inspiration and emotional depth through the dialogue and character interactions. It sets up a pivotal moment in Miguel's journey towards embracing his musical talent and family legacy.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the scene, focusing on the intersection of music, family, and personal identity, is compelling and well-executed. It delves into themes of self-discovery and following one's passion with authenticity and depth.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and serves to advance Miguel's character arc and the overall narrative. It introduces key themes and conflicts that will likely have significant repercussions in the story.

Originality: 8

The scene offers a fresh perspective on the theme of following one's passion and the sacrifices that come with it. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth and complexity to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-developed and showcase emotional depth and complexity. Miguel and de la Cruz's interactions are particularly poignant, revealing layers of their personalities and motivations.

Character Changes: 8

Miguel undergoes significant emotional growth and self-discovery in the scene, as he grapples with his passion for music and family legacy. His interaction with de la Cruz marks a pivotal moment in his character arc.

Internal Goal: 9

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to seek validation and approval from his idol, De la Cruz. This reflects his deeper need for acceptance and recognition.

External Goal: 8

Miguel's external goal is to understand De la Cruz's journey and decision to choose music over everything else. This reflects the immediate challenge of reconciling his admiration with potential regrets.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is emotional conflict present in the scene, it is more internal and reflective, focusing on Miguel's inner struggles and desires. The conflict is subtle but impactful in driving the character's growth.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong in the sense that Miguel is faced with conflicting emotions and decisions, creating a sense of tension and uncertainty.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high in the scene, as Miguel confronts his inner conflicts and seeks validation for his musical aspirations. The outcome of his interaction with de la Cruz could have significant implications for his future.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by deepening Miguel's journey and setting up key conflicts and resolutions. It propels the narrative towards important revelations and character developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in the sense that the audience is unsure how Miguel will react to De la Cruz's revelations about his past and his advice for the future.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between following one's passion and the sacrifices that come with it. De la Cruz emphasizes the importance of staying true to oneself, even if it means leaving behind family.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, eliciting feelings of inspiration, nostalgia, and hope. The heartfelt moments between Miguel and de la Cruz resonate with the audience, creating a powerful connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is impactful and serves to deepen the relationships between the characters. It effectively conveys emotions and themes, adding depth to the narrative.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional depth of the characters, the exploration of universal themes, and the dynamic dialogue between De la Cruz and Miguel.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a gradual build-up of tension and emotion leading to a satisfying resolution. The rhythm of the dialogue enhances the scene's effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures a pivotal moment in Miguel's journey, where he seeks validation from his idol, Ernesto de la Cruz. The dialogue is poignant and reveals Miguel's internal conflict about pursuing music versus familial obligations. However, the emotional weight could be enhanced by deepening Miguel's vulnerability. Instead of just asking if de la Cruz regrets his choices, Miguel could share a personal anecdote about his own struggles with family expectations, making the moment more relatable and impactful.
  • De la Cruz's response is somewhat generic and lacks depth. While he acknowledges the difficulty of leaving his hometown, he doesn't fully explore the emotional ramifications of his choices. Adding a specific memory or a moment of regret could create a more nuanced character and provide a stronger contrast to Miguel's aspirations. This would also help to establish de la Cruz as a more complex figure rather than a one-dimensional idol.
  • The visual elements of the scene, such as the piles of gifts and the fireworks, are vibrant and contribute to the celebratory atmosphere. However, the setting could be used more effectively to reflect Miguel's internal struggle. For instance, the overwhelming gifts could symbolize the superficiality of fame, contrasting with the deeper connections Miguel yearns for with his family. This thematic layering would enrich the scene and provide a more profound commentary on the nature of success and sacrifice.
  • The transition to the fireworks feels abrupt. While it serves as a visual cue for celebration, it could be better integrated into the emotional arc of the scene. Perhaps the fireworks could start as Miguel expresses his doubts, symbolizing the conflict between his dreams and the reality of his family's expectations. This would create a more cohesive emotional journey for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a personal anecdote from Miguel that highlights his struggles with family expectations, making his question to de la Cruz more impactful.
  • Deepen de la Cruz's character by including a specific memory or moment of regret related to his choices, allowing for a more nuanced conversation.
  • Use the visual elements of the scene to reflect Miguel's internal conflict, such as having the overwhelming gifts symbolize the superficiality of fame versus the importance of family.
  • Integrate the fireworks more smoothly into the emotional arc of the scene, perhaps starting them during Miguel's moment of doubt to symbolize the conflict between dreams and family.



Scene 43 -  Revelations on the Veranda
EXT. VERANDA

The party guests move outside to watch the light show.


INT. DE LA CRUZ’S MANSION

The hall has emptied, the lights are turned down. Bursts of
color from outside flash across the walls. The only light
coming from inside the hall are de la Cruz's film clips that
continue to play on the walls.

De la Cruz and Miguel descend the staircase into the empty
hall.

DE LA CRUZ
Soon, the party will move across
town for my "Sunrise Spectacular!"
(beat)
Miguel, you must come to the show!
You will be my guest of honor!

Miguel's eyes light up.

MIGUEL
You mean it?!




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DE LA CRUZ
Of course, my boy!

Miguel's chest swells. Then deflates. He lifts his shirt,
revealing the skeletal transition partway up his torso.

MIGUEL
I can't... I have to get home
before sunrise.

DE LA CRUZ
Oh, I really do need to get you
home.

De la Cruz plucks a marigold petal from a vase.

DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
It has been an honor. I am sorry
to see you go, Miguel. I hope you
die very soon.
(beat)
You know what I mean.
(beat)
Miguel. I give you my bles--

HÉCTOR (O.S.)
We had a deal, chamaco!

They are startled.

DE LA CRUZ
Who are you? What is the meaning
of this?

From the shadows, Héctor, dressed as Frida, steps into the
light.

DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
Oh, Frida! I thought you couldn't
make it.

Héctor takes off the wig and throws his outfit off.

HÉCTOR
You said you'd take back my photo.
You promised, Miguel.

Miguel turns, backing into de la Cruz's arms. De la Cruz
rises to his feet, hands defensively on Miguel's shoulders.

DE LA CRUZ
(to Miguel)
You know this, uh... man?



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MIGUEL
I just met him tonight. He told me
he knew you--

As Héctor steps forward with the photo, de la Cruz slowly
recognizes him.

DE LA CRUZ
Hé-- Héctor?

HÉCTOR
Please Miguel, put my photo up.

Héctor pushes the photo into Miguel's hands. De la Cruz
intercepts it.

He looks from the picture to the gray, faded skeleton who
kneels before him. Héctor looks weak.

DE LA CRUZ
My friend... you're being
forgotten...

HÉCTOR
And whose fault is that?

DE LA CRUZ
Héctor, please--

HÉCTOR
Those were MY songs you took. MY
songs that made YOU famous.

MIGUEL
W-What?

HÉCTOR
If I'm being forgotten, it's
because you never told anyone that
I wrote them--

MIGUEL
That's crazy, de la Cruz wrote all
his own songs.

HÉCTOR
(to de la Cruz)
You wanna tell him, or should I?

DE LA CRUZ
Héctor, I never meant to take
credit.
(beat)
(MORE)

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DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
We made a great team but -- you
died and I -- I only sang your
songs because I wanted to keep a
part of you alive.

HÉCTOR
Oh, how generous.

MIGUEL
You really did play together...

HÉCTOR
Look, I don't want to fight about
it. I just want you to make it
right. Miguel can put my photo up--

DE LA CRUZ
Héctor...

HÉCTOR
--And I can cross over the bridge.
I can see my girl.

De la Cruz looks at the photo, deliberating.

HÉCTOR
Ernesto... Remember the night I
left?

DE LA CRUZ
That was a long time ago.

HÉCTOR
We drank together and you told me
you would move heaven and earth for
your amigo. Well, I'm asking you
to now.

MIGUEL
Heaven and earth? Like in the
movie?

HÉCTOR
What?

MIGUEL
That's Don Hidalgo's toast... in
the de la Cruz movie, "El Camino A
Casa."

HÉCTOR
I'm talking about my real life,
Miguel.



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MIGUEL
No, it's in there. Look.

Miguel looks around and points to the movie clip projected
across the room.

FILM CLIP:

DON HIDALGO (FILM CLIP)
Never were truer words spoken.
This calls for A TOAST! To our
friendship! I would move Heaven
and Earth for you, mi amigo.

MIGUEL
But in the movie, Don Hidalgo
poisons the drink...

DON HIDALGO (FILM CLIP)
Salud!

In the clip Don Hidalgo and de la Cruz drink. De la Cruz
spits his drink.

DE LA CRUZ (FILM CLIP)
Poison!

Héctor's gears are turning too.

HÉCTOR
That night, Ernesto. The night I
left...

FLASHBACK:
Genres: ["Animation","Musical","Fantasy"]

Summary On the veranda of de la Cruz's mansion, party guests enjoy a light show while Miguel and de la Cruz descend into a colorful hall. De la Cruz invites Miguel to be the guest of honor at his 'Sunrise Spectacular,' but Miguel reveals he must leave before sunrise. Tension rises when Héctor confronts de la Cruz, accusing him of stealing his songs and revealing the truth about his betrayal. As Miguel grapples with this revelation, Héctor pleads for help to reclaim his identity, leading to a flashback that hints at deeper connections between the characters.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Revelatory moments
  • Intense character interactions
Weaknesses
  • Potential for confusion with the multiple revelations and conflicts

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful, revealing crucial information and setting up a significant turning point in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of betrayal, redemption, and the consequences of actions is effectively explored in this scene.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with major revelations and character development.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on the mentor-mentee relationship, with a twist of betrayal and redemption. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are deeply explored, revealing their true motivations and inner conflicts.

Character Changes: 9

Multiple characters undergo significant changes in their beliefs and relationships during this scene.

Internal Goal: 9

Miguel's internal goal is to uncover the truth about his idol, de la Cruz, and to find a way to honor his family's legacy without sacrificing his own dreams.

External Goal: 8

Miguel's external goal is to return home before sunrise to prevent being trapped in the Land of the Dead forever.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between characters is intense and drives the emotional core of the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals, hidden agendas, and emotional stakes that create uncertainty and tension.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as characters confront past betrayals and seek redemption.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing crucial information and setting up future conflicts.

Unpredictability: 8

The scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected revelations, conflicting motivations, and shifting alliances among the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the themes of betrayal, legacy, and the importance of truth. It challenges Miguel's beliefs about his idol and the sacrifices made for fame.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotionally impactful, with deep revelations and intense character interactions.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is impactful and drives the emotional intensity of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its emotional intensity, character dynamics, and plot twists that keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to a climactic confrontation that propels the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-paced dialogue and character interactions, effectively building tension and emotional stakes.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension by juxtaposing Miguel's excitement about being invited to the 'Sunrise Spectacular' with the looming threat of his skeletal transition. This contrast heightens the stakes and emphasizes Miguel's internal conflict between his passion for music and the urgency to return home before sunrise.
  • The dialogue between de la Cruz and Héctor is compelling, revealing the complex history between the two characters. However, the pacing feels slightly rushed as the confrontation escalates. More pauses or beats could enhance the emotional weight of the moment, allowing the audience to absorb the gravity of the accusations.
  • Héctor's entrance is dramatic and serves as a pivotal moment in the scene, but the transition from the light show to the confrontation could be smoother. The abrupt shift from celebration to conflict may disorient the audience. A more gradual transition could help maintain narrative flow.
  • The use of film clips as a visual element is a clever way to provide context and backstory, but it may distract from the live action. Ensuring that the clips enhance rather than overshadow the characters' interactions is crucial. Consider using them more sparingly or integrating them more seamlessly into the dialogue.
  • The emotional stakes are high, but the scene could benefit from deeper character exploration. Miguel's reaction to the revelation about de la Cruz's betrayal could be more pronounced, showcasing his internal struggle and confusion. This would help the audience connect more deeply with his character.
Suggestions
  • Introduce more pauses in the dialogue to allow characters to process their emotions, particularly during the confrontation between Héctor and de la Cruz. This will enhance the tension and give the audience time to absorb the implications of their words.
  • Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Miguel after de la Cruz's invitation, where he grapples with the implications of staying versus returning home. This could deepen his character development and heighten the emotional stakes.
  • Smooth the transition from the light show to the confrontation by incorporating a moment where Miguel is momentarily distracted by the fireworks, allowing de la Cruz and Héctor to approach him more subtly.
  • Limit the use of film clips to key moments that directly relate to the dialogue, ensuring they serve to enhance the narrative rather than distract from it. This could involve using clips that visually echo the themes of betrayal and friendship discussed in the scene.
  • Explore Miguel's emotional response to the revelation about de la Cruz's betrayal more thoroughly. This could involve a physical reaction, such as a moment of hesitation or disbelief, to make his internal conflict more visible to the audience.



Scene 44 -  A Bittersweet Farewell
INT. MEXICO CITY HOTEL ROOM

Héctor throws a songbook in a suitcase, shuts it. He grabs
his guitar case like he means to leave.

HÉCTOR (V.O.)
We'd been performing on the road
for months. I got homesick -- and
I packed up my songs...

YOUNG DE LA CRUZ
You wanna give up now? When we're
this close to reaching our dream?

YOUNG HÉCTOR
This was your dream. You'll
manage.



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YOUNG DE LA CRUZ
I can't do this without your songs,
Héctor--

De la Cruz grabs young Héctor’s suitcase, but Héctor pulls
away.

YOUNG HÉCTOR
I'm going home, Ernesto.
(beat)
Hate me if you want, but my mind is
made up.

De la Cruz looks angry. For a moment his face darkens. But
he composes himself.

YOUNG DE LA CRUZ
Oh, I could never hate you. If you
must go, then I'm... I'm sending
you off with a toast!

De la Cruz pours a couple of drinks. He gives one to Héctor.

YOUNG DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
To our friendship. I would move
Heaven and Earth for you, mi amigo.
Salud!

They both drink.
Genres: ["Drama","Musical"]

Summary In a hotel room in Mexico City, Héctor prepares to leave, feeling homesick after months of touring. Young De la Cruz desperately tries to convince him to stay, believing he cannot achieve his dreams without Héctor's songs. Despite the tension, Héctor remains resolute in his decision to go home. Ultimately, De la Cruz accepts Héctor's choice and proposes a toast to their friendship, leading to a bittersweet moment as they drink together, symbolizing both farewell and camaraderie.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth of characters
  • Revealing dialogue
  • Pivotal conflict
Weaknesses
  • Limited physical action
  • Reliance on dialogue for tension

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys the emotional depth of the characters and sets up a significant conflict that will impact the story moving forward. The dialogue is impactful and reveals important aspects of the characters' motivations and relationships.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring the friendship and betrayal between Héctor and de la Cruz is engaging and adds depth to the story. The scene effectively introduces key themes and conflicts that will drive the narrative forward.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene, with the revelation of Héctor's departure and de la Cruz's reaction setting up a major conflict. The scene also hints at deeper secrets and motivations that will impact the characters' choices.

Originality: 8.5

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of pursuing dreams and personal fulfillment, with authentic character actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Héctor and de la Cruz are well-developed in this scene, with their conflicting emotions and past decisions driving the narrative forward. The scene reveals important aspects of their personalities and motivations.

Character Changes: 8

Both Héctor and de la Cruz undergo significant emotional changes in this scene, with Héctor reaffirming his decision to leave and de la Cruz expressing regret over their friendship. The scene sets up future character development and conflicts.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal is to follow his heart and return home, despite the pressure to continue pursuing his dream with his partner.

External Goal: 7.5

Héctor's external goal is to leave the music partnership and return home, reflecting his immediate desire to reconnect with his roots.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Héctor and de la Cruz is intense and emotionally charged, driving the scene forward and setting up future confrontations. The tension between the characters adds depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and uncertainty, adding depth to the character interactions.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, with the characters' conflicting emotions and past decisions leading to a major confrontation. The outcome of this conflict will have significant consequences for the characters and the story.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward significantly, introducing key conflicts and motivations that will drive the narrative. The revelation of Héctor's departure and de la Cruz's reaction set up future developments and confrontations.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is somewhat predictable in its outcome, but the emotional depth and character conflicts add layers of complexity.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict is between pursuing personal fulfillment and loyalty to a friend's dream. It challenges Héctor's values and beliefs about following his own path.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, with the characters' conflicting emotions and past regrets resonating with the audience. The poignant moment of reflection and regret adds depth to the characters and their relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is impactful and reveals key information about the characters' relationships and motivations. The interactions between Héctor and de la Cruz are tense and emotional, adding depth to their dynamic.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to the emotional tension and character dynamics, keeping the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional stakes, leading to a satisfying resolution.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to standard formatting conventions for its genre, enhancing readability and clarity.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a traditional structure for character conflict and resolution, fitting the genre expectations.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the emotional conflict between Héctor and Young De la Cruz, showcasing their differing aspirations. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext to deepen the tension. For instance, instead of Young De la Cruz simply stating he can't do it without Héctor's songs, he could express a deeper fear of failure or abandonment, which would add layers to his character.
  • The use of a voiceover from Héctor adds a reflective quality to the scene, but it might be more impactful if it were integrated more seamlessly with the action. Currently, it feels somewhat detached from the visual storytelling. Consider using the voiceover to enhance the emotional stakes in real-time rather than as a retrospective commentary.
  • The transition from the emotional confrontation to the toast feels abrupt. While the toast serves as a moment of camaraderie, it could be more poignant if it were framed as a bittersweet farewell rather than a celebratory gesture. This would align better with the underlying tension and Héctor's decision to leave.
  • The visual elements in the scene are somewhat lacking. The setting of a hotel room could be more vividly described to reflect the emotional weight of the moment. For example, details about the clutter of the room, the state of the suitcase, or the atmosphere could enhance the audience's connection to the characters' emotional states.
  • The character dynamics are clear, but the stakes could be raised further. What does Héctor stand to lose by leaving? What does De la Cruz risk if Héctor goes? Making these stakes more explicit would heighten the emotional impact of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate more subtext in the dialogue to reveal deeper fears and motivations of both characters. This could involve Young De la Cruz expressing his insecurities about achieving their dreams without Héctor's support.
  • Consider integrating the voiceover more closely with the action, perhaps by having Héctor's thoughts reflect his internal struggle in real-time rather than as a retrospective narration.
  • Reframe the toast as a bittersweet farewell, emphasizing the emotional weight of the moment. This could involve Young De la Cruz acknowledging the potential loss of their partnership while still trying to maintain a facade of positivity.
  • Enhance the visual description of the hotel room to reflect the emotional stakes of the scene. Details about the environment can help ground the audience in the characters' emotional turmoil.
  • Clarify the stakes for both characters. What does Héctor risk by leaving, and what does De la Cruz stand to lose? Making these stakes explicit will create a more compelling conflict.



Scene 45 -  Betrayal Under the Stars
EXT. EMPTY STREET

HÉCTOR (V.O.)
You walked me to the train station.

They walk down an empty street at night, Héctor with suitcase
and guitar case in tow. Héctor stumbles, de la Cruz steadies
him, takes his guitar case.

HÉCTOR (V.O.)
But I felt a pain in my stomach. I
thought it must have been something
I ate...

YOUNG DE LA CRUZ
Perhaps it was that chorizo my
friend...

HÉCTOR (V.O.)
Or something I... drank.




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A few more steps and Héctor collapses in the street. FADE TO
BLACK.

HÉCTOR (V.O.)
I woke up dead.

BACK TO:


INT. DE LA CRUZ’S MANSION

HÉCTOR
You... POISONED me.

DE LA CRUZ
You're confusing movies with
reality, Héctor.

HÉCTOR
All this time I thought it was just
bad luck.

FLASHBACK:


EXT. EMPTY STREET

Héctor's suitcase is opened. A hand reaches in to take the
songbook.

HÉCTOR
I never thought that you might
have... that you...

BACK TO:
Genres: ["Drama","Mystery","Thriller"]

Summary Héctor and de la Cruz walk down a deserted street at night, where Héctor's physical distress leads to his collapse. The scene shifts to de la Cruz's mansion, where Héctor accuses de la Cruz of poisoning him, only to be dismissed. This confrontation reveals Héctor's realization of deeper betrayal, contrasting the earlier camaraderie with a dark sense of impending doom.
Strengths
  • Revealing betrayal adds depth to the story
  • Tension and emotion are effectively conveyed
  • Strong performances enhance the impact of the scene
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be predictable for experienced viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, with a strong reveal that significantly impacts the plot and character relationships. The tension and emotion are effectively conveyed.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of betrayal and manipulation adds depth to the story and characters, creating a compelling narrative arc.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly with the revelation of the betrayal, setting up new conflicts and character dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the afterlife and betrayal themes, blending elements of mystery and drama with cultural influences. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and grounded in their motivations.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters' relationships are tested and changed by the revelation, leading to new developments and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant changes in their relationships and motivations due to the revelation, leading to new arcs and conflicts.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to uncover the truth behind his death and confront the person responsible. This reflects his deeper need for closure and justice, as well as his fear of being forgotten or misunderstood.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to confront the person he believes poisoned him and seek revenge or justice. This reflects the immediate challenge of proving his innocence and seeking retribution.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict reaches a peak with the revelation of betrayal, creating intense emotional and narrative tension.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, as the protagonist faces betrayal and deception from someone he trusted. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome, adding to the tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are raised with the revelation of betrayal, as characters face the consequences of deception and manipulation.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing crucial information and setting up new conflicts and developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twist of the protagonist being poisoned and the revelation of betrayal by a trusted friend. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the conflict will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between truth and deception, as the protagonist grapples with the idea that someone he trusted may have betrayed him. This challenges his beliefs in the goodness of people and the reliability of his own judgment.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The emotional impact of the scene is high, as characters grapple with betrayal and its consequences.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension and emotion of the scene, enhancing the impact of the revelation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mysterious atmosphere, dramatic reveals, and emotional stakes. The audience is drawn into the protagonist's journey and invested in uncovering the truth behind his death.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a gradual reveal of information and emotional beats that drive the story forward. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences enhances the scene's impact.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows standard screenplay formatting conventions, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the reader's understanding of the setting and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a traditional three-act structure, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness in building tension and suspense.


Critique
  • The scene effectively uses voiceover to provide context and emotional depth, allowing the audience to connect with Héctor's internal struggle. However, the transition from the voiceover to the visual action could be smoother. The abrupt shift from Héctor's recollection to the present confrontation with de la Cruz may confuse viewers who are not following the timeline closely.
  • The dialogue between Héctor and de la Cruz is impactful, revealing the betrayal and tension in their relationship. However, the line 'You're confusing movies with reality, Héctor' feels somewhat dismissive and could benefit from a more nuanced response that reflects de la Cruz's manipulative nature. This would enhance the emotional stakes and highlight de la Cruz's character more effectively.
  • The visual imagery of the empty street and the nighttime setting creates a somber atmosphere that complements the themes of betrayal and loss. However, the scene could benefit from more descriptive details about the environment to enhance the mood. For instance, incorporating sounds or visual cues (like distant music or flickering streetlights) could immerse the audience further into the scene.
  • The fade to black after Héctor collapses is a strong choice, symbolizing the transition from life to death. However, the subsequent return to the mansion could be more impactful if it included a brief moment of silence or a sound cue that emphasizes the gravity of the situation. This would heighten the emotional weight of the moment.
  • The flashback sequence is a powerful storytelling device, but it feels slightly disjointed. The connection between the suitcase being opened and the accusation of poisoning could be made clearer. Adding a visual cue or a line of dialogue that directly links the two moments would strengthen the narrative flow.
Suggestions
  • Consider refining the transition between the voiceover and the visual action to create a more seamless narrative flow. Perhaps start with a visual cue that hints at the memory before diving into the voiceover.
  • Revise de la Cruz's response to Héctor's accusation to reflect a more manipulative and cunning character. This could involve him downplaying the situation or deflecting blame, which would add complexity to his character.
  • Enhance the atmospheric details of the empty street scene by incorporating sensory elements, such as sounds or visual descriptions, to create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • Add a moment of silence or a poignant sound cue after Héctor collapses to emphasize the gravity of the situation before transitioning back to the mansion.
  • Clarify the connection between the flashback and the present moment by adding a line of dialogue or a visual cue that links the suitcase and the songbook to the theme of betrayal.



Scene 46 -  Confrontation at the Mansion
INT. DE LA CRUZ’S MANSION

Héctor clenches his jaw. Then he bounds at de la Cruz,
tackling him to the ground.

HÉCTOR
How could you?!

MIGUEL
Héctor!

DE LA CRUZ
Security! Security!

Miguel watches as Héctor and Ernesto scuffle on the floor.




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HÉCTOR
You took everything away from me!

Security guards rush in to pull Héctor off Ernesto. Héctor
struggles, but it's no use.

HÉCTOR
You rat!

DE LA CRUZ
Have him taken care of. He's not
well.

The guards drag Héctor through a wide doorway.

HÉCTOR
I just wanted to go back home! No,
no, NO!

The doors slam shut and cut off his shouts. Miguel is left
alone with de la Cruz.

DE LA CRUZ
I apologize. Where were we?

MIGUEL
You were going to give me your
blessing...

DE LA CRUZ
Yes. Uh... sí.

De la Cruz pulls up a marigold petal, but hesitates.

DE LA CRUZ
Miguel, my reputation, it is very
important to me. I would hate to
have you think...

MIGUEL
That you murdered Héctor... for his
songs?

DE LA CRUZ
You don't think that. Do you?

MIGUEL
I -- no! Everyone knows you're
the... the good guy.

Doubt enters Miguel's mind. De la Cruz darkens, he places
the photo of Héctor in his coat pocket, gears turning in his
mind.



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MIGUEL
Papá Ernesto? My blessing?

De la Cruz crumples the marigold petal.

DE LA CRUZ
Security!

De la Cruz's guards appear in the doorway.

DE LA CRUZ (CONT'D)
Take care of Miguel. He'll be
extending his stay.

The guards grab Miguel by the shoulder.

MIGUEL
What?! But I'm your family!

DE LA CRUZ
And Héctor was my best friend.

Miguel goes pale.

DE LA CRUZ
Success doesn't come for free,
Miguel. You have to be willing to
do whatever it takes to... seize
your moment. I know you
understand.

Miguel is dragged away.

MIGUEL
No, NO!
Genres: ["Drama","Mystery","Thriller"]

Summary In a tense confrontation at de la Cruz's opulent mansion, Héctor accuses de la Cruz of betrayal, expressing his anger and desperation. Security guards intervene, forcibly removing Héctor despite his protests. Left alone with de la Cruz, Miguel grapples with his admiration for the musician and his loyalty to Héctor. De la Cruz manipulates the situation, downplaying Héctor's accusations and revealing his true nature by ordering Miguel's detention, claiming that success requires sacrifices. The scene culminates in Miguel being dragged away, helplessly asserting his familial ties while de la Cruz coldly maintains control.
Strengths
  • Intense conflict
  • Emotional depth
  • Revealing character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Slightly predictable outcome
  • Some cliched dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, with high stakes, emotional depth, and significant character development. The tension and conflict are palpable, keeping the audience engaged throughout.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of betrayal and ambition is central to the scene, driving the conflict and character motivations. It adds depth to the story and sets up future developments.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with key revelations and character dynamics shifting. The conflict escalates, setting the stage for the resolution.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on themes of betrayal and ambition, with authentic character actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' motivations and relationships are explored in depth, adding layers to their personalities. The emotional impact of their interactions is profound.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant changes in this scene, particularly in their perceptions of each other and themselves. The revelations alter their trajectories and relationships.

Internal Goal: 8

Héctor's internal goal is to confront de la Cruz and seek justice for the betrayal he feels. This reflects his deeper need for closure and redemption.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal is to receive de la Cruz's blessing, which reflects the immediate challenge of gaining approval and acceptance.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and multi-layered, with emotional and moral dilemmas driving the characters' actions. The stakes are high, leading to a gripping confrontation.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals and power struggles creating uncertainty for the characters.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are high, with personal and moral consequences for the characters. The outcome of the confrontation will have a lasting impact on the story.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing crucial information, deepening the conflict, and setting up future events. It marks a turning point in the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the shifting power dynamics and moral ambiguity of the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between loyalty and ambition. Héctor values loyalty and family, while de la Cruz prioritizes ambition and success at any cost.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the audience, with tension, betrayal, and revelation fueling the characters' arcs. The emotional depth adds resonance to the narrative.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp and impactful, revealing the characters' true intentions and emotions. It drives the conflict and adds depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense conflict, moral dilemmas, and suspenseful pacing.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense gradually.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear action lines and dialogue cues.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a dramatic confrontation, building tension and conflict effectively.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension through the physical confrontation between Héctor and de la Cruz, showcasing Héctor's desperation and anger. However, the emotional stakes could be heightened by providing more context about what Héctor has lost, allowing the audience to empathize with his plight more deeply.
  • Miguel's reaction to the scuffle is somewhat passive. As the protagonist, he should be more actively involved in the conflict, perhaps trying to mediate or express his own fears about de la Cruz. This would enhance his character development and make the stakes feel more personal.
  • De la Cruz's manipulation is clear, but his motivations could be more explicitly stated. The audience understands he is self-serving, but a line or two that hints at his fear of losing power or his past failures could add depth to his character and make his actions more relatable.
  • The dialogue is effective in conveying the urgency of the situation, but it could benefit from more subtext. For instance, when Miguel questions de la Cruz about the murder, a more nuanced response from de la Cruz could reveal his cunning nature and further manipulate Miguel's perception.
  • The pacing of the scene feels rushed, particularly in the transition from the physical altercation to Miguel's confrontation with de la Cruz. Slowing down the moment when Miguel realizes the truth about de la Cruz could amplify the emotional impact and allow the audience to absorb the gravity of the situation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief flashback or a line of dialogue that highlights what Héctor has lost due to de la Cruz's actions, which would deepen the audience's emotional connection to the conflict.
  • Enhance Miguel's involvement in the scene by having him attempt to intervene during the scuffle or express his fears about de la Cruz more vocally, showcasing his internal struggle between loyalty and doubt.
  • Incorporate a line or two from de la Cruz that hints at his insecurities or fears regarding his reputation and success, which would add complexity to his character and motivations.
  • Revise de la Cruz's dialogue to include more subtext, allowing him to manipulate Miguel's perception subtly while revealing his true nature, which would create a more layered conflict.
  • Slow down the pacing during the transition from the physical altercation to Miguel's confrontation with de la Cruz, allowing for a moment of reflection that emphasizes Miguel's realization of the truth about his family and de la Cruz.



Scene 47 -  Embrace of Regret
EXT. DE LA CRUZ'S TOWER

The guards drag Miguel out the back of de la Cruz's mansion.

MIGUEL
Let go!

They throw him into a cenote, an inescapable sinkhole behind
the estate.


INT. CENOTE

MIGUEL
NO! AHHHHHH!




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He falls four stories and splashes into the pool at the
bottom of the hole. He breaks the surface and swims to a
stone island in the center.

MIGUEL
Help! Can anyone hear me? I wanna
go home!

Miguel collapses on the stone island.

His soaked hoodie sags off his shoulders. The skeletal
transition is almost complete.

A moment of silence. He is alone.

Suddenly, Miguel hears a noise. Footsteps. Héctor emerges
from the darkness, looking beat up. Héctor stumbles.

MIGUEL
Héctor?

HÉCTOR
Kid?

MIGUEL
Oh, Héctor!

They run to each other. Héctor embraces Miguel. But Miguel
is overcome with shame.

MIGUEL
You were right. I should have gone
back to my family--

Héctor tries to calm him but Miguel is shaking.

HÉCTOR
Hey -- hey, hey...

MIGUEL
They told me not to be like de la
Cruz, but I didn't listen--

HÉCTOR
Hey, it's okay...

MIGUEL
I told them I didn't care if they
remembered me. I didn't care if I
was on their stupid ofrenda.

Héctor holds Miguel to his chest. Miguel is tense.




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HÉCTOR
Hey, chamaco, it's okay. It's
okay.

MIGUEL
I told them I didn't care.

Suddenly, a golden flicker flutters through Héctor's bones,
and he falls to his knees.

HÉCTOR
Hhuuh!

MIGUEL
Héctor! Héctor--

HÉCTOR
She's... forgetting me.

Miguel looks at Héctor with concern.

MIGUEL
Who?

HÉCTOR
My daughter...

MIGUEL
She's the reason you wanted to
cross the bridge...

HÉCTOR
I just wanted to see her again...
(beat)
I never should have left Santa
Cecilia. I wish I could apologize.
I wish I could tell her that her
papá was trying to come home. That
he loved her so much.
(beat)
My Coco...

A chill runs through Miguel.

MIGUEL
Coco?

Miguel reaches into his hoodie and pulls out the photo of
Imelda, Coco, and the faceless musician.

Miguel shows the photo to Héctor. Héctor is confused; it’s
like he's seen a ghost.




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HÉCTOR
Where... where did you get this?

MIGUEL
That's my Mamá Coco. That's my
Mamá Imelda. Is that... you?

Gears turn in both of their heads.

HÉCTOR
We're...

HÉCTOR MIGUEL
...family? ...family?

Héctor is as shocked as Miguel. He looks at his great-great
grandson.

He looks to the photo, touches the image of baby Coco, and he
becomes saddened.

HÉCTOR
I always hoped I'd see her again.
That she'd miss me... maybe put up
my photo. But it never happened.
(beat)
You know the worst part?
(beat)
Even if I never got to see Coco in
the living world... I thought at
least one day I'd see her here.
Give her the biggest hug...
(beat)
But she's the last person who
remembers me. The moment she's
gone from the living world...

MIGUEL
You disappear... from this one.
You'll never get to see her...

HÉCTOR
...Ever again.

Héctor is quiet for a moment.

HÉCTOR
You know, I wrote her a song once.
We used to sing it every night at
the same time, no matter how far
apart we were. What I wouldn't
give to sing it to her... one last
time.



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Héctor sings softly, plaintively.

DISSOLVE TO:


FLASHBACK:
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Musical","Adventure"]

Summary Miguel is thrown into a cenote by guards and swims to a stone island, feeling ashamed as his skeletal transition nears completion. He reunites with Héctor, who is heartbroken over being forgotten by his daughter, Coco. They share their regrets and discover their familial bond through a photo, leading to a poignant moment where Héctor wishes to sing to Coco one last time. The scene is filled with somber reflections on family and loss, ending with Héctor softly singing a song he wrote for Coco.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Revelations
  • Reconciliation
Weaknesses
  • Limited external conflict
  • Some predictable elements

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally impactful, well-paced, and crucial for character development and plot progression.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family connections, regret, and reconciliation is effectively explored in the scene, adding depth to the characters and the overall narrative.

Plot: 9

The plot is significantly advanced through the emotional revelations and reconciliation between Miguel and Héctor. It sets up important conflicts and resolutions for the story.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the theme of family and memory, with a unique setting and emotional depth. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Miguel and Héctor are well-developed in this scene, showcasing their emotional depth, vulnerabilities, and growth. Their interactions are authentic and moving.

Character Changes: 9

Both Miguel and Héctor undergo significant emotional changes in the scene, leading to a deeper understanding of themselves and their relationship.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with his mistakes and feelings of shame, as well as to understand the importance of family and memory. This reflects his deeper needs for connection, belonging, and redemption.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to find a way to return home and reunite with his family. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of being trapped in the cenote and facing the consequences of his actions.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, focusing on the emotional struggles and revelations of the characters. It sets up important decisions and resolutions.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with internal and external conflicts challenging the protagonist's beliefs and actions. The uncertainty of the outcome adds tension and suspense.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high in terms of emotional impact and character development. The revelations and reconciliation have long-lasting consequences for the characters and the story.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing crucial information about the characters' pasts, motivations, and relationships. It sets up important conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected revelations and emotional twists. The audience is kept on edge as the characters confront their past and present.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the importance of family, memory, and legacy. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about individuality and self-importance, as well as the value of relationships and connections.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of sadness, hope, and empathy. The revelations and reconciliation between Miguel and Héctor are deeply moving.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and impactful, effectively conveying the emotions and thoughts of the characters. It adds depth to the scene and enhances the character dynamics.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional intensity, character development, and thematic depth. The audience is drawn into the protagonist's journey and struggles.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing emotional moments with action and dialogue. The rhythm of the scene keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' struggles.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue. The visual elements are effectively conveyed.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with a clear progression of events and character interactions. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The emotional stakes in this scene are high, as Miguel confronts the consequences of his choices and the reality of his connection to Héctor. The dialogue effectively conveys Miguel's shame and regret, which adds depth to his character. However, the pacing could be improved; the scene feels slightly rushed in its emotional beats, particularly in Miguel's realization of his familial connection to Héctor. Allowing for more pauses or reactions could enhance the emotional impact.
  • Héctor's character is well-developed in this scene, showcasing his vulnerability and longing for his daughter, Coco. The dialogue effectively reveals his regrets and desires, making him a sympathetic figure. However, the transition from Miguel's despair to Héctor's revelation about Coco could be smoother. The abrupt shift in focus might confuse the audience, so a more gradual build-up to this revelation would strengthen the narrative flow.
  • The visual elements of the cenote setting are compelling, creating a stark contrast between Miguel's isolation and the warmth of his connection with Héctor. However, the scene could benefit from more descriptive imagery to enhance the atmosphere. For instance, incorporating sensory details about the water, the stone island, or the darkness surrounding them could immerse the audience further into the scene.
  • The dialogue is poignant, but there are moments where it feels overly expository, particularly when Miguel explains his feelings about family and memory. Striking a balance between exposition and subtext would make the dialogue feel more natural and less like a direct explanation. Allowing the characters to express their emotions through actions or non-verbal cues could enhance the authenticity of their interactions.
  • The emotional climax of the scene, where Héctor expresses his desire to sing to Coco one last time, is powerful. However, the transition to the flashback could be more impactful. Instead of a simple dissolve, consider using a visual or auditory cue that ties the present moment to the past, reinforcing the emotional connection between the two timelines.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more pauses in the dialogue to allow characters to process their emotions, enhancing the scene's emotional weight.
  • Smooth out the transition between Miguel's despair and Héctor's revelation about Coco by incorporating a moment of reflection or a shared memory that leads into the discussion.
  • Enhance the sensory details of the cenote setting to create a more immersive experience for the audience, focusing on the sounds, sights, and feelings of the environment.
  • Revise the dialogue to reduce exposition and allow for more subtext, using actions or non-verbal communication to convey emotions and thoughts.
  • Use a more creative transition to the flashback, such as a musical cue or a visual motif that connects Miguel's present feelings to the memories of his family, reinforcing the emotional resonance of the moment.



Scene 48 -  A Bittersweet Farewell
INT. YOUNG COCO’S BEDROOM - DAY

HÉCTOR
(singing)
REMEMBER ME
THOUGH I HAVE TO SAY GOODBYE
REMEMBER ME
DON'T LET IT MAKE YOU CRY
FOR EVEN IF I'M FAR AWAY
I HOLD YOU IN MY HEART
I SING A SECRET SONG TO YOU
EACH NIGHT WE ARE APART
REMEMBER ME

YOUNG COCO
(giggling)
Papá!

HÉCTOR
(singing)
THOUGH I HAVE TO TRAVEL FAR
REMEMBER ME
EACH TIME YOU HEAR A SAD GUITAR

Father and daughter sing the song together.

HÉCTOR YOUNG COCO
(singing) (singing)
KNOW THAT I'M WITH YOU KNOW THAT I'M WITH YOU
THE ONLY WAY THAT I CAN BE THE ONLY WAY THAT I CAN BE
UNTIL YOU'RE IN MY ARMS AGAIN UNTIL YOU'RE IN MY ARMS AGAIN
REMEMBER ME REMEMBER ME

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Genres: ["Musical","Drama","Family"]

Summary In a tender scene, Héctor sings 'Remember Me' to his daughter, Young Coco, in her bedroom, creating a joyful yet bittersweet moment that reinforces their emotional bond despite the impending separation. As they sing together, the warmth of their connection shines through, highlighting themes of love and remembrance. The scene concludes with a fade to black, symbolizing the transition to a new moment in time.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Musicality
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Low external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally resonant, beautifully executed, and crucial for character development and plot progression.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of memory, love, and music as a bridge between generations is effectively portrayed and adds depth to the characters.

Plot: 8

The scene contributes to the overall plot by revealing the emotional backstory of Héctor and his relationship with Coco, adding layers to the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a father-daughter relationship through music, capturing the emotional complexity of love and memory. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The scene deepens the audience's understanding of Héctor and Young Coco, showcasing their bond and the impact of music on their relationship.

Character Changes: 8

The scene deepens the characters of Héctor and Young Coco, revealing their emotional depth and the impact of their shared memories.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to create a lasting memory with his daughter and to express his love for her through music. This reflects his deeper desire to be remembered and to maintain a connection with his family, even when he is far away.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to comfort his daughter and leave her with a sense of his presence and love, despite being physically apart.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 3

While there is emotional conflict in the scene, it is more internal and reflective rather than external and action-driven.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is minimal, as the focus is on the emotional connection between the characters rather than external conflicts.

High Stakes: 2

The stakes in the scene are more personal and emotional, focusing on the relationships between characters rather than external conflicts.

Story Forward: 7

While the scene doesn't significantly move the main plot forward, it enriches the character development and emotional resonance of the story.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in its emotional impact, as the audience is unsure of how the characters' relationship will evolve and how their emotions will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of love, memory, and connection. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs about the power of music and memory to transcend physical distance.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotionally impactful, evoking feelings of nostalgia, love, and connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and heartfelt, effectively conveying the emotions of the characters and the themes of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional depth and intimacy between the characters, drawing the audience into their relationship and the themes of love and memory.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by allowing the emotional tension to build gradually, leading to a poignant resolution.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear and concise descriptions of the characters' actions and dialogue.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively building emotional tension and resolution through the characters' interactions.


Critique
  • The emotional weight of this scene is palpable, as it captures a tender moment between Héctor and Young Coco. The lyrics of 'Remember Me' serve as a poignant reminder of their bond, effectively conveying the themes of love and longing that permeate the story.
  • The dialogue is minimal, relying heavily on the song to express the characters' emotions. This choice works well, as the song itself is rich with meaning and resonates with the audience. However, incorporating a few more lines of dialogue before or after the song could enhance the emotional depth and provide context for the audience.
  • The setting of Young Coco's bedroom is intimate and appropriate for this moment, reinforcing the familial connection. However, adding visual details about the room—such as toys, decorations, or family photos—could further enrich the scene and provide a stronger sense of place.
  • The transition into the song feels natural, but the scene could benefit from a more gradual build-up to the singing. Perhaps starting with a brief conversation or a moment of silence before the song begins would heighten the emotional impact when they start singing together.
  • The fade to black at the end is effective, but it might be more impactful to end on a visual of the two characters embracing or sharing a smile after the song, reinforcing the connection before transitioning to the next scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a few lines of dialogue before the song begins to establish the mood and context, allowing the audience to connect more deeply with the characters' emotions.
  • Enhance the visual details of Young Coco's bedroom to create a more vivid setting that reflects her personality and the family's history.
  • Introduce a moment of silence or a brief exchange before the song starts to build anticipation and emotional resonance.
  • Instead of fading to black, consider ending the scene with a visual moment that captures the bond between Héctor and Young Coco, such as a hug or a shared smile, to leave a lasting impression.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating subtle background elements, like the sound of a guitar or ambient noises, to enrich the atmosphere and enhance the emotional tone of the scene.



Scene 49 -  Reunion in the Cenote
INT. CENOTE

The echo of Héctor’s song fades to silence.

MIGUEL
He stole your guitar... He stole
your songs...
(beat)
(MORE)


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MIGUEL (CONT'D)
You should be the one the world
remembers, not de la Cruz!

HÉCTOR
I didn't write “Remember Me” for
the world... I wrote it for Coco.
I'm a pretty sorry excuse for a
great-great grandpa.

MIGUEL
Are you kidding? A minute ago I
thought I was related to a
murderer. You're a total upgrade!

Héctor doesn't smile. Miguel kneels close.

MIGUEL
My whole life, there's been
something that made me different...
and I never knew where it came
from.
(beat)
But now I know. It comes from you.
(beat)
I'm proud we're family!

Miguel looks up defiantly at the hole in the cenote.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
I'm proud to be his family!
TRRRRRAI-HAY-HAY-HAY-HAAAY!

Héctor perks up.

HÉCTOR
TRRRRRRAAAAAI-HAAAI-HAAAAAY!
I'm proud to be HIS family!

They trade off their gritos until the cenote echoes with the
sound. Soon though, the echoes fade. They're still stuck.
Suddenly they hear a distant howling.

DANTE (O.S)
Rooo-rooo-roooooooo!

Miguel and Héctor look up.

MIGUEL
Dante?

DANTE (O.S.)
(louder)
Roooooo-roo-roo-rooo!



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Up at the top of the cenote, Dante pokes his head in the
opening.

MIGUEL
Dante! It's Dante!

Dante pants and wags his tail happily. Behind him Pepita
peeks down through the hole and gives a powerful roar.
Pepita's call shakes the cavern. She lowers her head to
reveal Mamá Imelda riding atop her. Miguel and Mamá Imelda
laugh with joy. Until her gaze falls upon Héctor.

HÉCTOR
Imelda!

MAMÁ IMELDA
(icy)
Héctor.

HÉCTOR
You look good...


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Pepita flies out of the cenote; Imelda, Héctor, Miguel, and
Dante ride on her back. She ascends above the clouds.
Genres: ["Animation","Adventure","Family"]

Summary In a mystical cenote, Miguel confronts Héctor about his past injustices, expressing pride in their family bond. Héctor reveals he wrote 'Remember Me' for his daughter Coco, finding solace in Miguel's acceptance. Their joyful singing is interrupted by Dante's howling, leading to the arrival of Mamá Imelda on Pepita. Tension arises as Imelda sees Héctor, but the scene concludes with a sense of unity as they all ascend together, symbolizing their reconciliation despite past conflicts.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Family themes
  • Reconciliation
  • Poignant dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Limited external conflict
  • Reliance on emotional resolution

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene effectively conveys emotional depth, resolves key conflicts, and sets the stage for character growth and reconciliation. The dialogue is poignant, and the visuals enhance the sentimentality of the moment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family reconciliation and forgiveness is central to the scene, driving the emotional core of the narrative. The scene effectively explores themes of legacy and connection.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses by resolving conflicts and deepening character relationships. The revelation of familial ties and the characters' emotional journey add depth to the overall story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique mythical creatures and explores themes of family and identity in a fresh and engaging way. The dialogue feels authentic and heartfelt.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' growth and emotional arcs are well-developed in this scene, particularly Miguel, Héctor, and Mamá Imelda. Their interactions and dialogue reveal layers of complexity and vulnerability.

Character Changes: 8

The characters, particularly Miguel, Héctor, and Mamá Imelda, undergo significant emotional growth and reconciliation in this scene. Their relationships and perspectives shift, leading to a deeper understanding of themselves and each other.

Internal Goal: 9

Miguel's internal goal is to connect with his family and understand his identity. This reflects his deeper need for belonging and acceptance.

External Goal: 8

Miguel's external goal is to find a way out of the cenote and reunite with his family. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

While there is emotional conflict and tension in the scene, the focus is more on resolution and reconciliation. The conflict serves to highlight the characters' growth and the importance of forgiveness.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with emotional conflicts and obstacles that challenge the characters' beliefs and values. The audience is unsure of how the interactions will unfold.

High Stakes: 7

While the stakes are not life-threatening, the emotional stakes are high in this scene, as the characters confront past misunderstandings and strive for reconciliation. The outcome has a significant impact on their relationships and future actions.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by resolving key conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting the stage for the next narrative developments. It adds depth and emotional resonance to the overall plot.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected appearance of Dante and Pepita, as well as the emotional twists and turns in the dialogue.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict is between personal identity and family legacy. Héctor struggles with his role as a great-great-grandfather and his desire to be remembered by his family.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of nostalgia, regret, and hope. The reunion between the characters and the themes of family and forgiveness resonate deeply with the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and impactful, conveying the characters' emotions and motivations effectively. The exchanges between Miguel, Héctor, and Mamá Imelda drive the scene's emotional resonance.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional depth, character development, and fantastical elements. The audience is invested in Miguel's journey and the resolution of the conflict.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and emotion, leading to a satisfying resolution. The rhythm of the dialogue enhances the impact of the character interactions.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings and character actions. The dialogue is formatted correctly and enhances the emotional depth of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the emotional impact of the scene.


Critique
  • The emotional core of the scene is strong, with Miguel and Héctor's connection deepening as they confront the injustices of their family history. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtlety; while the characters express their feelings clearly, some lines feel a bit on-the-nose, which can detract from the emotional impact.
  • The transition from the somber tone of Héctor's song to the more lighthearted banter between Miguel and Héctor is effective, but it could be smoother. The shift in tone feels a bit abrupt, and a more gradual transition could enhance the emotional flow of the scene.
  • The introduction of Dante and Pepita adds a whimsical element, but the sudden shift to Mamá Imelda's icy demeanor feels jarring. It might be beneficial to build up to her entrance with more tension or foreshadowing, allowing the audience to anticipate her reaction to Héctor.
  • The use of the cenote as a setting is visually striking and thematically relevant, symbolizing both isolation and the depths of family secrets. However, the scene could explore the physicality of the setting more, using the environment to heighten the emotional stakes. For example, describing the water's coldness or the darkness surrounding them could amplify their feelings of entrapment.
  • The final lines, while humorous, could be more impactful if they were tied back to the central theme of family and memory. Instead of simply trading off gritos, perhaps they could reflect on their shared history or express a deeper understanding of their bond.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising some of the dialogue to make it feel more natural and less expository. Allow the characters to express their emotions through actions or subtext rather than direct statements.
  • Introduce Mamá Imelda with a moment of tension or conflict before she appears, perhaps through Miguel and Héctor's discussion about her or their fears regarding her reaction.
  • Enhance the physical description of the cenote to create a more immersive atmosphere, using sensory details to reflect the characters' emotional states.
  • Explore the emotional weight of the song 'Remember Me' further, perhaps by having Miguel and Héctor reflect on its significance to their family history before they sing it together.
  • Consider adding a moment of silence or reflection after the song before the entrance of Dante and Pepita, allowing the emotional weight of the moment to resonate with the audience.



Scene 50 -  Dante's Transformation
EXT. NIGHT SKY

Miguel, wind in his hair, hugs Dante fiercely.

MIGUEL
Dante, you knew he was my Papá
Héctor the whole time! You ARE a
real spirit guide!
(doggy-praise)
Who's a good spirit guide? You
are!

Dante smiles at Miguel dumbly. Suddenly, before Miguel's
eyes, neon patterns spread outward from the dog's paws.
Dante begins to freak out.

MIGUEL
Whoa...

A pair of little wings sprout on the dog’s back. He spreads
them. He jumps up to fly... and plummets beneath the clouds!

MIGUEL
Dante!



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But then he's back up, flapping goofily and barking his head
off, a full-blown spirit guide!
Genres: ["Animation","Fantasy","Adventure"]

Summary In a joyful scene set in the night sky, Miguel embraces Dante, realizing he has known all along that Héctor is his father. As Miguel praises Dante for being a true spirit guide, Dante undergoes a magical transformation, sprouting wings and emitting neon patterns. Initially struggling to fly, Dante falls, causing Miguel to worry, but he quickly recovers and joyfully takes to the skies, fully embodying his role as a spirit guide.
Strengths
  • Magical transformation of Dante
  • Emotional bond between Miguel and his spirit guide
  • Whimsical and fantastical elements
Weaknesses
  • Minimal dialogue
  • Lack of significant conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines elements of magic, emotion, and humor to create a memorable and engaging moment in the story. The transformation of Dante and the interaction between Miguel and his dog add depth to their relationship and advance the plot in a creative way.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of Dante transforming into a spirit guide adds a new dimension to the story and enhances the relationship between Miguel and his dog. The scene introduces a magical element that enriches the fantasy world of the film and sets the stage for further adventures.

Plot: 7

While the scene primarily focuses on the transformation of Dante and the emotional connection between characters, it contributes to the overall plot by deepening the bond between Miguel and his spirit guide. The scene sets the stage for future developments and character growth.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the concept of spirit guides and the afterlife, incorporating unique visual elements and character dynamics. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The scene highlights the relationship between Miguel and Dante, showcasing their loyalty and mutual affection. The characters are portrayed with depth and emotion, adding complexity to their interactions and setting the stage for further character development.

Character Changes: 7

While there is no significant character change in this scene, it deepens the relationship between Miguel and Dante, setting the stage for potential growth and development in their dynamic. The scene strengthens their bond and hints at future transformations.

Internal Goal: 8

Miguel's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with the fact that Dante is a real spirit guide and to accept his role in Miguel's journey. This reflects Miguel's deeper need for guidance and connection with his ancestors.

External Goal: 7

Miguel's external goal in this scene is to understand Dante's true nature and abilities as a spirit guide. This reflects the immediate challenge of navigating the spirit world and finding his way back to the land of the living.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 3

The scene lacks significant conflict, focusing more on the emotional and magical elements of the story. The conflict is minimal, allowing for a moment of joy and discovery between characters.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Miguel facing the challenge of accepting Dante's abilities as a spirit guide and navigating the spirit world.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on the emotional and magical elements of the story. The transformation of Dante and the bond between characters are central to the scene, with minimal external conflict or high stakes.

Story Forward: 6

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new magical element and deepening the emotional connection between characters. While it does not significantly advance the plot, it sets the stage for future developments and character arcs.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the sudden reveal of Dante's abilities as a spirit guide, adding a sense of mystery and surprise to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Miguel's disbelief in the supernatural and the reality of the spirit world. This challenges Miguel's beliefs and worldview, forcing him to confront the existence of spirits and spirit guides.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, as it showcases the deep bond between Miguel and Dante and the magical transformation of the dog into a spirit guide. The moment is tender, joyful, and heartwarming, resonating with the audience.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue in the scene is minimal but effective in conveying the emotions and intentions of the characters. The interactions between Miguel and Dante are heartfelt and authentic, adding depth to their relationship.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, emotion, and magical elements, keeping the audience invested in Miguel's journey and the unfolding mystery of Dante's true nature.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to the dramatic reveal of Dante's true nature as a spirit guide.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings and character actions.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, effectively building tension and revealing key plot points.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures a moment of joy and revelation for Miguel as he embraces Dante, realizing the dog's true nature as a spirit guide. This emotional connection is crucial for character development and reinforces the theme of family and legacy.
  • The dialogue is playful and light-hearted, which contrasts nicely with the previous tense scenes. However, it could benefit from a bit more depth or reflection on Miguel's feelings about his father, Héctor, to enhance the emotional weight of the moment.
  • The visual imagery of Dante sprouting wings and the neon patterns adds a whimsical touch, fitting the fantastical elements of the story. However, the transition from excitement to concern when Dante falls could be more pronounced to heighten the tension and stakes in the moment.
  • The pacing of the scene is quick, which works well for the comedic elements, but it may feel rushed for viewers who are still processing the emotional revelations from the previous scenes. A brief pause or a moment of reflection from Miguel could help balance the pacing.
  • The scene ends on a humorous note with Dante's goofy flapping, which is entertaining but may undermine the emotional gravity of Miguel's earlier realization. A stronger emotional beat at the end could provide a more satisfying conclusion to the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line where Miguel reflects on what it means for him to have a spirit guide, perhaps expressing gratitude or a deeper understanding of his connection to Héctor.
  • Enhance the moment when Dante falls by incorporating Miguel's immediate reaction—perhaps a brief moment of panic or concern—before Dante recovers, to create a stronger emotional arc.
  • Introduce a visual cue or sound effect that emphasizes the magical transformation of Dante, making it feel more significant and impactful for the audience.
  • Allow for a brief pause after Miguel's realization before transitioning to Dante's transformation, giving the audience a moment to absorb the emotional weight of the scene.
  • Consider ending the scene with a line that ties back to Miguel's journey or his relationship with his family, reinforcing the theme of connection and legacy as they prepare for the next adventure.



Scene 51 -  A Family Reunion and a Plea for Forgiveness
EXT. SMALL PLAZA

Pepita flies in, landing in a small plaza where the other
Riveras wait.

PAPÁ JULIO
Look, there they are!

The Dead Riveras come rushing up.

FAMILY
Miguel! / Miguelito! / Ay, gracias
a Dios! / It’s Miguel! / He’s all
right! / Oh thank goodness! /
Gracias, Dios mío!

They dismount from Pepita. Héctor falls off first but gets
up and raises his arm to help Imelda. She gives him a
withering stare and dismounts without his help. Miguel pets
Dante and Pepita gives Miguel a big lick.

Imelda rounds Pepita's shoulder and folds Miguel into a tight
hug.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Mijo, I was so worried! Thank
goodness we found you in time!

Imelda's eyes fall on Héctor, who holds his hat in his hands
sheepishly.

MAMÁ IMELDA
And you! How many times must I
turn you away?

HÉCTOR
Imelda--

MAMÁ IMELDA
I want nothing to do with you. Not
in life, not in death!
(beat)
I spent decades protecting my
family from your mistakes. He
spends five minutes with you and I
have to fish him out of a sinkhole!

Miguel steps between Imelda and Héctor.




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MIGUEL
I wasn't in there ‘cause of Héctor.
He was in there ‘cause of me.
(beat)
He was just trying to get me
home... I didn't wanna listen, but
he was right... nothing is more
important than family.

Mamá Imelda looks at Héctor, shocked to hear the sentiment.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
I'm ready to accept your
blessing... and your conditions.
But first, I need to find de la
Cruz. To get Héctor's photo.

MAMÁ IMELDA
What?

MIGUEL
So he can see Coco again. Héctor
should be on our ofrenda. He's
part of our family--

MAMÁ IMELDA
He left this family!

MIGUEL
He tried to go home to you and
Coco... but de la Cruz murdered
him!

Startled, she looks to Héctor for confirmation.

HÉCTOR
It's true, Imelda.

Imelda wrestles with her emotions.

MAMÁ IMELDA
And so what if it's true? You
leave me alone with a child to
raise and I'm just supposed to
forgive you?

HÉCTOR
Imelda, I--

Héctor's body suddenly shimmers, leaving him winded. Imelda
gasps.




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MIGUEL
Héctor?

HÉCTOR
I'm running out of time. It's
Coco...

MAMÁ IMELDA
She's forgetting you...

MIGUEL
You don't have to forgive him...
But we shouldn't forget him.

MAMÁ IMELDA
(to Héctor)
I wanted to forget you. I wanted
Coco to forget you too, but--

HÉCTOR
This is my fault, not yours.
(beat)
I'm sorry, Imelda.

Mamá Imelda, holding in her emotions, turns to Miguel.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel, if we help you get his
photo... you will return home? No
more music?

MIGUEL
Family comes first.

Mamá Imelda considers. She turns to Héctor.

MAMÁ IMELDA
I -- I can't forgive you. But I
will help you.

Miguel smiles.

MAMÁ IMELDA
(to Miguel)
So how do we get to de la Cruz?

Miguel furrows his brow.

MIGUEL
I might know a way...




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Genres: ["Animation","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a small plaza in the Land of the Dead, Miguel reunites with the Rivera family, bringing relief and joy. However, tension arises between Imelda and Héctor, as Imelda blames Héctor for Miguel's troubles. Miguel defends Héctor, emphasizing family bonds and expressing his desire to honor Héctor by retrieving his photo from de la Cruz. Despite her lingering resentment, Imelda ultimately agrees to help Miguel, marking a step towards reconciliation as they navigate their complex family dynamics.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Plot progression
  • Family reconciliation
Weaknesses
  • Some repetitive dialogue
  • Slightly predictable resolution

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally charged, with well-developed character dynamics and significant plot progression. The conflict and stakes are high, leading to a powerful resolution.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family reconciliation and forgiveness is central to the scene, driving the character interactions and emotional arcs. The theme of prioritizing family over personal ambitions is effectively explored.

Plot: 9

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene, with key revelations about Héctor's past and the impact on the Rivera family. The conflict between characters adds depth to the narrative.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on family relationships, forgiveness, and redemption. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and emotionally resonant.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and undergo significant growth in this scene, particularly Imelda and Héctor. Miguel's maturity and decision to prioritize family showcase his character development.

Character Changes: 9

Multiple characters undergo significant changes in this scene, particularly Imelda, Héctor, and Miguel. Their growth and reconciliation drive the emotional core of the narrative.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal is to reconcile the conflicting emotions he feels towards his family and Héctor. He wants to honor his family's traditions while also seeking justice for Héctor's murder.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to find de la Cruz and retrieve Héctor's photo to help him reunite with his daughter, Coco.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Imelda, Héctor, and Miguel is intense and emotionally charged, adding depth to the scene. The resolution of past betrayals and misunderstandings creates a high level of conflict.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting emotions, moral dilemmas, and unresolved conflicts between the characters. The audience is unsure of how the characters' relationships will evolve.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, as the characters confront past betrayals, seek forgiveness, and prioritize family bonds. The emotional weight of the decisions adds intensity to the narrative.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by resolving key conflicts, revealing important truths, and setting up the next narrative arc. The plot progression is crucial for the overall story.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the shifting dynamics between the characters, unexpected revelations, and moral dilemmas that challenge the audience's expectations.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around forgiveness, family loyalty, and the consequences of past actions. Imelda struggles with forgiving Héctor for his past mistakes, while Héctor seeks redemption and acceptance.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a significant emotional impact on the audience, eliciting feelings of regret, forgiveness, and hope. The heartfelt moments between family members resonate deeply.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and impactful, conveying the emotional turmoil and resolution between the characters. The conversations reveal deep-seated emotions and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, character conflicts, and moral dilemmas. The audience is invested in the characters' journeys and the resolution of their conflicts.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of emotional moments, character interactions, and plot developments. The rhythm of the scene enhances its effectiveness and impact.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and impact of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character arcs and emotional beats. The pacing and dialogue flow naturally, contributing to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The emotional stakes in this scene are high, as it addresses the complex relationships between Miguel, Héctor, and Mamá Imelda. The dialogue effectively conveys the tension and unresolved feelings, particularly Imelda's struggle with her past and her feelings towards Héctor. However, the scene could benefit from more subtlety in the emotional transitions, as some lines feel a bit on-the-nose, particularly when Miguel states, 'nothing is more important than family.' This could be shown through actions or reactions rather than explicitly stated.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but it could be tightened in places. For instance, the back-and-forth between Imelda and Héctor could be more dynamic, perhaps incorporating physical actions or reactions that reflect their emotional states, rather than relying solely on dialogue. This would enhance the visual storytelling and keep the audience engaged.
  • The stakes are raised effectively with the revelation that Héctor is fading, which adds urgency to the scene. However, the transition from the emotional confrontation to the resolution feels a bit abrupt. The moment where Imelda agrees to help Miguel could be expanded to show her internal conflict more clearly, perhaps through a brief moment of hesitation or a flash of memory that illustrates her struggle with forgiveness.
  • The use of physicality in the scene is somewhat limited. Imelda's 'withering stare' and Héctor's 'sheepish' demeanor are good descriptors, but the scene could benefit from more physical interactions that illustrate their emotional states. For example, Imelda could physically distance herself from Héctor or Miguel could reach out to both of them, emphasizing his role as a bridge between the two.
  • The dialogue is strong, but there are moments where it could be more natural. For instance, Imelda's line about wanting to forget Héctor feels a bit scripted. Consider incorporating more interruptions or overlapping dialogue to reflect the heightened emotions and the chaotic nature of their reunion.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more physical actions to complement the dialogue, such as gestures or movements that reflect the characters' emotional states. This will enhance the visual storytelling and make the scene feel more dynamic.
  • Expand on Imelda's internal conflict before she agrees to help Miguel. A brief moment of hesitation or a flashback could provide depth to her character and make her eventual decision feel more earned.
  • Tighten the pacing by cutting any repetitive lines or phrases that do not add to the emotional weight of the scene. Focus on the most impactful lines that drive the narrative forward.
  • Incorporate more overlapping dialogue or interruptions to create a sense of urgency and chaos during the emotional confrontation. This will make the scene feel more realistic and engaging.
  • Explore the use of silence or pauses in the dialogue to emphasize the weight of certain moments, particularly when Imelda grapples with her feelings towards Héctor. This can create a more powerful emotional impact.



Scene 52 -  Dawn of Performance
EXT. SUNRISE SPECTACULAR AMPHITHEATER - BEFORE DAWN

Crowds are congregated at de la Cruz's Sunrise Spectacular
which takes place in an open air amphitheater. They hurry to
their seats as the lights begin to dim.


ON STAGE

Frida's performance piece begins. Dramatic symphonic music
plays as a giant papaya appears to ignite on stage. The
"seeds" in the body of the papaya unfurl to reveal that they
are dancers, each dressed like Frida Kahlo, right down to the
painted on unibrow.

The dancers roll out of the "flaming" papaya and gyrate their
bodies nonsensically.

A giant cactus that resembles Frida is illuminated, and all
the dancers slink to it.

In the midst of this, eight familiar looking dancers (the
Dead Riveras and Miguel) inch their way out of the spotlights
and to the wings of the stage.


STAGE WING

FRIDA
Good luck, muchacho.

MIGUEL
Gracias Frida!
Genres: ["Musical","Fantasy","Drama"]

Summary In the vibrant setting of de la Cruz's Sunrise Spectacular, a crowd gathers as Frida's dramatic performance begins with symphonic music and a giant igniting papaya. Dancers dressed as Frida Kahlo emerge, performing lively routines around a giant cactus resembling her. Amidst the spectacle, Miguel, a key dancer, receives heartfelt encouragement from Frida, highlighting their mentor-student bond as he prepares to face his performance challenge.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Musical performance
  • Revelation about song's authorship
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Plot integration could be tighter

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines elements of music, fantasy, and drama to create a compelling and emotional moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Sunrise Spectacular event and the revelation about the song's true authorship adds depth to the story and characters.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses with the revelation about the song's authorship and the emotional moments between characters, but it could have been more tightly integrated into the overall narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its unconventional performance art, unique character interactions, and creative use of symbolism. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show growth and emotional depth in this scene, particularly Miguel and his family members.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters experience significant changes in this scene, particularly in their relationships and understanding of each other.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene may be to deliver a successful performance and impress the audience. This reflects their desire for recognition and validation of their talent.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to execute the performance smoothly and entertain the audience. This reflects the immediate challenge of performing in front of a live crowd.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, particularly with the revelation about the song's authorship and the tensions between characters.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with challenges and obstacles that create tension and uncertainty. The audience is kept engaged by the characters' struggles and conflicts.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high in the scene, especially with the revelation about the song's authorship and the tensions between characters.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing important information and deepening the emotional connections between characters.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unconventional nature of the performance and the unexpected twists in the character interactions. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between traditional performance art and avant-garde expression evident in this scene. The protagonist's beliefs and values may be challenged by the unconventional nature of the performance.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, especially in the moments of reconciliation and revelation.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotions and relationships between characters, but could have been more impactful in certain moments.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its visually captivating elements, dynamic character interactions, and the anticipation of the performance outcome. The audience is drawn into the surreal and artistic world of the scene.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of slow and fast moments that build tension and excitement. The rhythm of the performance enhances the overall effectiveness of the scene.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for a performance scene, with clear scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue. It enhances the visual and narrative flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a performance scene, with a clear setup, development, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively sets a vibrant and whimsical tone with the introduction of Frida's performance, which aligns well with the overall theme of celebration and family in the story. However, the description of the dancers rolling out of the papaya and gyrating nonsensically may come off as confusing or lacking clarity. It would benefit from more specific choreography or visual details to help the reader visualize the performance more vividly.
  • The transition from the dramatic performance to the backstage interaction with Miguel and Frida is a nice touch, showcasing the connection between the characters and the performance. However, the dialogue feels a bit abrupt and could use more emotional weight. Miguel's response to Frida could reflect his excitement or nervousness about the upcoming moment, adding depth to his character.
  • The use of the giant papaya and cactus as visual elements is creative and ties into the cultural context of the story. However, the symbolism behind these elements could be further explored or clarified. What do they represent in relation to Miguel's journey or the themes of the film? Providing a deeper connection could enhance the scene's impact.
  • The pacing of the scene feels slightly rushed, especially with the quick transition from the performance to the backstage dialogue. Allowing for a moment of awe or reflection from Miguel after witnessing the performance could create a stronger emotional resonance and give the audience time to absorb the spectacle.
  • The scene lacks a clear conflict or tension that drives the narrative forward. While it serves as a transitional moment, introducing a sense of urgency or stakes for Miguel could elevate the scene. For example, perhaps he is worried about being discovered or feels pressure to perform well, which would add layers to his character's emotional state.
Suggestions
  • Enhance the choreography description of the dancers to provide clearer visual imagery and make the performance more engaging for the audience.
  • Add emotional depth to Miguel's dialogue with Frida, reflecting his feelings about the performance and his journey, which would help the audience connect with his character.
  • Consider incorporating a brief moment of reflection for Miguel after the performance, allowing him to process the spectacle and its significance to his journey.
  • Introduce a subtle conflict or tension in this scene, such as Miguel's anxiety about the upcoming performance or fear of being discovered, to create a stronger narrative drive.
  • Explore the symbolism of the giant papaya and cactus further, perhaps by tying them into Miguel's personal journey or the themes of family and identity, to enrich the scene's meaning.



Scene 53 -  Confrontation in the Shadows
INT. BACKSTAGE CORRIDOR - MOMENTS LATER

The Dead Riveras congregate in a hidden backstage corridor,
shedding their Frida outfits. Miguel rips off his unibrow.

MIGUEL
Ow!

Dante has snuck in under Tío Oscar's skirt. Héctor sees that
Imelda is tangled up in her outfit.

HÉCTOR
Here, let me help you with--

MAMÁ IMELDA
Don't touch me.

The family joins together in a huddle.



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MIGUEL
Everyone clear on the plan?

TÍA VICTORIA
Find Héctor's photo.

PAPÁ JULIO
Give it to Miguel.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Send Miguel home.

HÉCTOR
Got your petals?

Each family member raises a marigold petal. Imelda leads the
way out of the corridor.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Now, we just have to find de la
Cruz--

Right around the corner is de la Cruz who turns with a smile.

DE LA CRUZ
Yes?

MAMÁ IMELDA
Ah!

The family stops in their tracks, still hidden from de la
Cruz's view. It's just him and Imelda. His smile drops.

DE LA CRUZ
Don't I know you?

Imelda pulls off her shoe and slaps de la Cruz across the
face with it.

MAMÁ IMELDA
That's for murdering the love of my
life!

DE LA CRUZ
(disoriented)
Who the?

Héctor leaps out from around the corner.

HÉCTOR
She's talking about me!
(to Imelda)
I'm the love of your life?



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MAMÁ IMELDA
I don't know! I'm still angry at
you.

DE LA CRUZ
Héctor?! How did you--

Imelda slaps de la Cruz again.

MAMÁ IMELDA
And that's for trying to murder my
grandson!

DE LA CRUZ
Grandson?

Now Miguel leaps out of the corridor.

MIGUEL
She's talking about me!

De la Cruz sees the three of them and puts the pieces
together.

DE LA CRUZ
You! Wait, you're related to
Héctor?

Miguel sees the photo in de la Cruz's pocket.

MIGUEL
The photo!

The rest of the Riveras emerge from the corridor.
Outnumbered, de la Cruz turns and runs.

MAMÁ IMELDA
After him!
Genres: ["Animation","Family","Adventure"]

Summary In a tense backstage corridor, the Dead Riveras discuss their plan to retrieve Héctor's photo. Tía Victoria supports the search, while Papá Julio and Mamá Imelda focus on giving the photo to Miguel. Their plans take a turn when they confront de la Cruz, leading to a heated exchange where Imelda slaps him for his past crimes against Héctor and Miguel. As the family reveals their connections to Héctor, de la Cruz realizes the implications and flees, prompting the Riveras to pursue him.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Tension building
  • Revelations
Weaknesses
  • Slightly predictable resolution
  • Some cliched dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-executed, with high emotional stakes, strong character development, and significant plot progression. The tension and conflict are palpable, leading to a satisfying resolution.


Story Content

Concept: 7

The concept of family dynamics, betrayal, and redemption is effectively explored in the scene. The revelation of long-held secrets adds depth to the characters and drives the plot forward.

Plot: 9

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene, with key revelations and character interactions shaping the narrative. The conflict is resolved, leading to a satisfying conclusion.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the confrontation between the protagonist and antagonist, with unexpected actions and revelations. The authenticity of the characters' emotions and motivations adds depth to the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with their emotions and motivations driving the scene forward. The interactions between the Riveras and de la Cruz are compelling and reveal new facets of their personalities.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters undergo significant changes in the scene, confronting their pasts and reevaluating their relationships. The revelations lead to personal growth and emotional catharsis.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to confront the antagonist, de la Cruz, and seek justice for the wrongs done to their family. This reflects their deeper need for closure, justice, and protection of their loved ones.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to retrieve Héctor's photo from de la Cruz and expose his true intentions. This reflects the immediate challenge of confronting the antagonist and protecting their family.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and emotionally charged, with long-held grievances coming to the surface. The confrontation between the characters adds depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the protagonist facing off against the antagonist in a high-stakes confrontation. The audience is unsure of how the conflict will be resolved, adding to the tension and drama.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene, with characters confronting long-held secrets and facing the consequences of their actions. The resolution of the conflict has significant implications for the characters' relationships.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, resolving key conflicts and setting the stage for the final act. The revelations and character interactions drive the narrative towards its conclusion.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and revelations, such as Imelda slapping de la Cruz and the family's confrontation with him. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the conflict will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the clash between justice and deception. The protagonist seeks justice for the wrongs done to their family, while de la Cruz represents deception and betrayal. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in honesty and integrity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, with characters expressing anger, regret, and determination. The resolution of the conflict is emotionally satisfying and resonant.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is impactful, conveying the characters' emotions and driving the conflict forward. The confrontational exchanges between the characters add depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, emotional conflict, and unexpected twists. The audience is drawn into the characters' struggles and motivations, creating a sense of suspense and anticipation.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense gradually, leading to a climactic confrontation. The rhythm of the dialogue and actions keeps the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the atmosphere and setting of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in building tension and suspense.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension and excitement as the Dead Riveras prepare to confront de la Cruz. The use of humor, particularly through the interactions between Imelda and Héctor, adds a light-hearted touch to an otherwise serious confrontation, which helps balance the emotional stakes.
  • The dialogue is snappy and captures the urgency of the moment. Each character's lines reflect their personalities well, especially Imelda's fierce protectiveness and Héctor's comedic confusion. However, some lines could be tightened for clarity and impact.
  • The physical comedy, such as Miguel ripping off his unibrow and Dante sneaking in under Tío Oscar's skirt, adds a playful element that contrasts nicely with the tension of the confrontation. This visual humor enhances the scene's overall tone.
  • The pacing is brisk, which suits the urgency of the situation. However, the transition from the family huddle to the confrontation with de la Cruz could be smoother. A brief moment of hesitation or a shared look among the family members before they confront de la Cruz could heighten the dramatic tension.
  • The reveal of de la Cruz is well-timed, but his initial reaction feels a bit underwhelming. Given the stakes, a more dramatic or fearful response from him could enhance the tension and highlight the danger he poses to Miguel and the family.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of hesitation or a shared glance among the family members before they confront de la Cruz to build tension and anticipation.
  • Tighten some of the dialogue to enhance clarity and impact, ensuring that each line serves to advance the plot or deepen character relationships.
  • Enhance de la Cruz's initial reaction to the family's presence to reflect the gravity of the situation and his awareness of the stakes involved.
  • Explore the dynamics between Imelda and Héctor further, perhaps through a brief exchange that highlights their complicated relationship, adding depth to the confrontation.
  • Incorporate more physicality in the scene, such as the family members positioning themselves strategically as they prepare to confront de la Cruz, to visually convey their unity and determination.



Scene 54 -  The Spotlight of Truth
INT. BELOW STAGE

De la Cruz knocks over a group of giant sugar skull dancers.
He emerges at a full sprint to where his rising platform is
set up.

DE LA CRUZ
Security! Ayúdenme!

The Riveras flood out after him. Héctor jogs next to Imelda.

HÉCTOR
You said "love of your life..."



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MAMÁ IMELDA
I don't know WHAT I said!

MIGUEL
That's what I heard...

A brawl ensues between the family and the guards.

De la Cruz runs to a stage door.

STAGEHAND
Places, señor, you're on in 30
seconds!

De la Cruz shoves the stagehand out of the way.

As security guards try to wrangle the Riveras, Imelda reaches
de la Cruz and gets her hands on Héctor's photo. De la Cruz
scuffles with her to get it back, when Miguel tackles de la
Cruz to the ground. De la Cruz loses his grip; Imelda
tumbles backward, photo in hand.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel! I have it!

Miguel turns toward Imelda but is chased by guards.

Suddenly, Imelda rises into the air. She is on de la Cruz's
rising platform! She is lifted through the ceiling and up to
the stage.

De la Cruz hurries up the stairs after her.

Miguel is detained by a security guard when Dante flies in
and knocks the guard’s head clean off. Miguel, Héctor, Tía
Victoria, and Tía Rosita hurry up the stairs after de la
Cruz.

MIGUEL
Hurry, come on!

Papá Julio, Tío Oscar, and Tío Felipe block the guards from
following the others.


ON STAGE

ANNOUNCER (O.S.)
Ladies and gentlemen... the one,
the only... ERNESTO DE LA CRUZ!




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The platform rises onto the stage and the spotlight falls on
Imelda. Neon letters blast brightly behind her, spelling
"ERNESTO!" The audience bursts into applause!

CROWD MEMBER
Nesto!

Imelda appears onscreen for all to see.


STAGE WING RIGHT

De la Cruz rushes up a staircase and arrives in the wings.
He gets the attention of his guards and points to Imelda.

DE LA CRUZ
Get her off the stage!

His guards hustle onto the stage, scaling the set to get to
her.


STAGE WING LEFT

Miguel, Héctor, Victoria, and Rosita emerge to see Imelda
spotlit above them.


ON STAGE

De la Cruz's guards begin to approach Imelda. She is frozen,
unable to move.

MIGUEL (O.S.)
Sing!

Mamá Imelda looks down and sees Miguel in the wing.

MIGUEL (CONT'D)
SING!

Imelda, seeing that the guards are approaching, closes her
eyes, grasps the mic, and follows Miguel's instructions.

MAMÁ IMELDA
(singing)
AY DE MÍ, LLORONA
LLORONA DE AZUL CELESTE...




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STAGE WING LEFT

Héctor's mouth gapes open. Tía Victoria and Tía Rosita go
wide-eyed.

Miguel sets Héctor up with a guitar, then adjusts a mic stand
in front of him. Héctor plays the guitar, its sound
amplified through the stage speakers.


ON STAGE

MAMÁ IMELDA
AY DE MÍ, LLORONA
LLORONA DE AZUL CELESTE...

The guards reach the edge of her spotlight but stop short,
not wanting to interrupt the performance.

Imelda takes the spotlight with her as she descends the on
stage staircase. As she comes down, she makes eye contact
with her husband in the wing. He smiles as he accompanies
her. Imelda's eyes glint, touched to see him supporting her.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Y AUNQUE LA VIDA ME CUESTE, LLORONA,
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE.
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE!

As Héctor accompanies Imelda, she becomes more confident.
The audience begins to clap.

De la Cruz grunts in frustration.

Soon, the stage conductor joins with more instrumentation,
which kicks into high gear.

MAMÁ IMELDA
ME SUBÍ AL PINO MÁS ALTO, LLORONA,
A VER SI TE DIVISABA.

She doubles down on her performance, taking the spotlight
with her as she moves to put distance between her and the
guards.

Imelda continues to vamp, trying to navigate away from the
guards and toward her family. One guard blocks her way, but
she grabs him and forces him to dance. Scared of the
spotlight, he runs away.

MAMÁ IMELDA
COMO EL PINO ERA TIERNO, LLORONA
AL VERME LLORAR, LLORABA.
(MORE)

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MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
AY DE MÍ, LLORONA, LLORONA,
LLORONA DE AZUL CELESTE...

She heads to leave the stage when she is stopped by a hand on
her wrist. A voice joins her in harmony, the spotlight
widens to reveal Ernesto de la Cruz singing too. The crowd
goes wild.

DE LA CRUZ/MAMÁ IMELDA
AY DE MÍ, LLORONA, LLORONA
LLORONA DE AZUL CELESTE...

He dances Imelda around the stage, all the while trying to
get to Héctor's photo.

DE LA CRUZ/MAMÁ IMELDA
Y AUNQUE LA VIDA ME CUESTE, LLORONA,
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE.

DE LA CRUZ
Y AUNQUE LA VIDA ME CUESTE, LLORONA,
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE.
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE!

MAMÁ IMELDA
Let go of me!

DE LA CRUZ
NO DEJARÉ DE QUERERTE!
...AY, AY, AY!

At the finale of the song, Imelda stomps her heel into de la
Cruz's foot on his high note, causing him to let her go. She
runs off stage with the photo.


BACKSTAGE

Imelda arrives off stage and, somewhat high on adrenaline,
she embraces Héctor.

MAMÁ IMELDA
I forgot what that felt like.

Héctor is taken by surprise. Imelda, realizing the
impropriety, pulls away from him awkwardly.

HÉCTOR
You... still got it.

They smile at each other, softening. Miguel, off to the
side, clears his throat.




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MIGUEL
Ahem.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Oh!

Imelda, now reminded, gives Miguel the photo. She pulls out
her petal.

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel, I give you my blessing.

The petal glows.

MAMÁ IMELDA (CONT'D)
To go home... to put up our
photos...
(beat)
And to never...

Miguel looks slightly saddened, anticipating the condition.

MIGUEL
Never play music again...

Imelda smiles.

MAMÁ IMELDA
To never... forget how much your
family loves you.

The petal surges. Miguel brightens, touched.

HÉCTOR
You're going home.

DE LA CRUZ
You're not going anywhere!

Suddenly Miguel is yanked away from his great-great
grandparents by de la Cruz. De la Cruz has grabbed Miguel by
the scruff of his hoodie.

Imelda lunges at de la Cruz, but he pushes her to the floor.

HÉCTOR
Imelda--

De la Cruz drags Miguel away as his family encroaches.

DE LA CRUZ
Stay back! Stay back. All of you!




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De la Cruz drags Miguel further and further back on the
stage.

DE LA CRUZ
Stay back! Not one more step.

Dante growls and tries to grab Miguel.

MIGUEL
Dante!

De la Cruz pulls Miguel away, closer to the ledge of the
building.

Héctor struggles but continues pursuing de la Cruz.

HÉCTOR
(winded)
Ernesto, stop! Leave the boy
alone!

Héctor stumbles, shimmering like before. He falls to the
ground.

DE LA CRUZ
I've worked too hard, Héctor...
Too hard to let him destroy
everything...

In the stage wings, Tía Rosita commandeers one of the cameras
and points it toward de la Cruz. Tía Victoria sidles up to a
control board and pushes a volume dial up.

HÉCTOR
He's a living child, Ernesto!

DE LA CRUZ
He's a threat!

CUT TO:


STADIUM

The image of de la Cruz holding Miguel hostage is projected
on the stadium screens, the audience falls to a hush as they
watch.

BACK TO:




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BACKSTAGE

Miguel struggles against de la Cruz.

DE LA CRUZ
You think I'd let him go back to
the land of the living with your
photo? To keep your memory alive?
(beat)
No.

MIGUEL
You're a coward!

DE LA CRUZ
I am Ernesto de la Cruz, the
greatest musician of all time!

MIGUEL
Héctor's the real musician, you're
just the guy who murdered him and
stole his songs!

CUT TO:


STADIUM

The crowd is gobsmacked by what they are hearing.

CROWD
Murder?

BACK TO:


BACKSTAGE

DE LA CRUZ
I am the one who is willing to do
what it takes to seize my moment...
(darkening)
Whatever it takes.

Suddenly, de la Cruz throws Miguel off of the structure.

MIGUEL
AHHH!

HÉCTOR
NO!

The family runs to the ledge, horrified.



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TÍO OSCAR/TÍO FELIPE
Miguel!

MAMÁ IMELDA
Miguel!

CUT TO:


STADIUM

The audience gasps. Some shrieks.

BACK TO:


BACKSTAGE

De la Cruz crosses from the ledge, past Héctor, who remains
collapsed on the floor, breathless.

DE LA CRUZ
Apologies old friend, but the show
must go on...

CUT TO:

Miguel is in free fall, the photo still in his hand. As the
wind whips against his face, he hears a faint howling.

Dante slices downward through the air, catches Miguel's shirt
in his teeth, and opens his wings. He and Miguel jerk
upward, but the photo falls from Miguel's hands and