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Scene 1 -  A Macabre Christmas Eve
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THE ADDAMS FAMILY
by

Larry Wilson and Caroline Thompson



Rewrite by

Paul Rudnick



based on the characters of

Charles Addams




SHOOTING SCRIPT

April 11, 1991
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/6/90

FADE IN:

A1 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION FRONT STEPS - CHRISTMAS EVE A1

A GROUP OF CAROLERS, their eager faces upturned, SINGS an
endless and cloying roundelay of "Little Drummer Boy."
They sing with self-righteous good cheer. As they
pompously begin their umpteenth verse,

THE CAMERA SLOWLY PANS UP THE ADDAMS MANSION -- past
the black wreath on the front door, past broken windows,
weather-beaten shingles, a creaking shutter.

THE CAMERA CONTINUES TO PAN TO THE ROOF

where the Addams Family members, GOMEZ, MORTICIA, GRANNY,
PUGSLEY, WEDNESDAY, and LURCH, their faithful butler,
gleefully POUR a CAULDRON OF BUBBLING, STEAMING PITCH
over the edge.

AS THE CAULDRON TIPS, THE CAMERA PUSHES INSIDE, THE
BLACKNESS OF THE PITCH FILLS THE SCREEN. TITLES BEGIN.

DISSOLVE TO:

1 INT. DIM HALLWAY - SEVEN O'CLOCK A.M. 1

C.U. AN OVER-SIZED "CUCKOO" CLOCK --

The clock is a perfect REPLICA OF THE ADDAMS FAMILY
HOUSE, down to the creaking shutter. It chimes the hour.

In ONE WINDOW, a LITTLE MECHANICAL GOMEZ bends a
MECHANICAL MORTICIA back until she's almost off her feet
and plants a kiss between her clockwork decolletage.
One, two, three mechanical kisses, counting toward
seven o'clock.

IN ANOTHER WINDOW, A MECHANICAL PUGSLEY hangs a
MECHANICAL WEDNESDAY from a noose on a gallows, up and
down.

Meanwhile, little BURSTS OF FOG float off the rooftop
where a little MECHANICAL GRANNY cranks her fog machine.

The front door of the house pops open, and a MECHANICAL
LURCH appears and begins sweeping.

Just then, THING, the disembodied hand with the
full-bodied personality, CLIMBS into view over the back
of the clock.

Thing leaps to the floor and SCAMPERS down the hall.

LOW TRACKING SHOT

follows Thing along the hallway.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 2.

1 CONTINUED: 1

He runs past a couple of doors, past a pair of LEGS in
pajamas, feet in bedroom slippers. He skids to a halt
and BACK TRACKS to the legs. He pulls on the cuff of
the pajama bottoms. They belong to GOMEZ, who stands
in the doorway to
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary On Christmas Eve, cheerful carolers sing outside the eerie Addams Mansion, where the Addams Family engages in their darkly comedic holiday antics. Gomez, Morticia, Granny, Pugsley, Wednesday, and Lurch create chaos by pouring bubbling pitch on the unsuspecting singers. Inside, a whimsical cuckoo clock chimes as mechanical figures mimic the family's actions, while Thing scurries about, adding to the playful yet macabre atmosphere. The scene highlights the stark contrast between the festive cheer of the carolers and the Addams family's unconventional spirit.
Strengths
  • Unique setting
  • Dark humor
  • Eccentric characters
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot development
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets the tone for the rest of the screenplay with its dark humor and fantastical elements, engaging the audience from the start.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a darkly humorous Christmas Eve with the Addams Family is intriguing and sets the stage for the rest of the story.

Plot: 7

While the plot is not heavily developed in this scene, it effectively introduces the characters and the setting of the Addams Family mansion.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and original take on the traditional Christmas caroling scene by subverting expectations and embracing the macabre.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-established through their actions and interactions, showcasing their eccentricities and dynamics within the family.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in this scene, as it primarily focuses on introducing the characters and setting.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to maintain their unique identity and embrace their unconventional lifestyle, despite societal norms and expectations.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to disrupt the carolers and assert their individuality and eccentricity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild conflict between the traditional carolers and the unconventional Addams Family, adding humor to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the carolers and societal expectations, creating conflict and humor.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and character introduction.

Story Forward: 7

The scene sets the stage for the story to unfold by introducing the Addams Family and their unique world.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the Addams Family's unconventional actions and reactions to the carolers.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the clash between societal norms and the Addams Family's unconventional values and beliefs. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs in embracing their uniqueness.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a light-hearted and amused emotional response from the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty and humorous, reflecting the unique personalities of the Addams Family members.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dark humor, quirky characters, and unexpected twists.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and humor.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a clear setup and resolution.


Critique
  • The opening scene effectively sets the tone for the Addams Family universe, blending dark humor with holiday cheer. However, the juxtaposition of cheerful carolers and the eerie mansion could be enhanced by emphasizing the carolers' obliviousness to the Addams family's true nature, which would deepen the comedic irony.
  • The description of the mansion is vivid, but it could benefit from more sensory details to immerse the audience further. For instance, incorporating sounds (like creaking wood or howling wind) or smells (like burnt pitch) could enhance the atmosphere.
  • The transition from the exterior to the interior is smooth, but the mechanical clock sequence feels a bit too on-the-nose. While it establishes the quirky nature of the family, it might be more effective to show the family's eccentricities through their actions rather than through mechanical figures, which could come off as overly gimmicky.
  • The introduction of Thing is delightful, but the tracking shot could be more dynamic. Instead of a low tracking shot that follows Thing, consider using a more playful camera movement that mimics Thing's personality, such as quick cuts or a whimsical zoom to emphasize his mischievousness.
  • The scene lacks dialogue, which is typical for an opening, but it might benefit from some light banter or internal monologue from Gomez or Morticia as they prepare for the day. This could provide insight into their characters and set up the family dynamics early on.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment where the carolers react to the mansion, perhaps with a nervous laugh or a comment about its appearance, to heighten the contrast between their cheerfulness and the Addams family's dark humor.
  • Incorporate more sensory details to create a richer atmosphere. Describe the sounds of the mansion, the smell of the pitch, or the coldness of the air to draw the audience into the scene.
  • Instead of relying solely on mechanical figures, show the family's quirks through their interactions. For example, have Gomez and Morticia share a playful moment that hints at their relationship dynamics while engaging with the clock.
  • Experiment with the camera movement to reflect Thing's personality. Quick cuts or playful angles could add energy to the scene and make it feel more alive.
  • Introduce a line or two of dialogue or internal thoughts from Gomez or Morticia to provide character insight and establish their relationship early in the scene.



Scene 2 -  A Brother's Absence and a Wife's Unhappiness
A2 INT. FESTER'S ROOM A2

Gomez wears a fez and a smoking jacket over his pajamas.
Even at this early hour, he puffs on his trademark cigar.
Gomez is all enthusiasm or all despair. At the moment,
he radiates unfathomable woe.

GOMEZ
Think of it, Thing. He's been gone
for twenty-five years. For twenty-
five years we've attempted to
contact Fester in the great
beyond...

The room is a dusty, cobweb-filled, long-unoccupied shrine
to Gomez's lost brother, Fester. Gomez drifts in from the
doorway.

The room has remained untouched since Fester's
disappearance as a teenager. The thick coating of dust
and cobwebs adorns the mementoes of a rapscallion's youth
- a football pennant from Alcatraz, headless sports
trophies, a high school photo with all the other students
keeping as much distance from Fester as possible.

As he lovingly and morosely surveys the room:

GOMEZ
... And for twenty-five years,
nothing. Not a whisper, not a
clue. I'm beginning to think my
my brother truly is lost.

Gomez sighs. Thing TUGS at his cuff, pulling him towards
the

B2 INT. HALLWAY - SAME TIME B2

Galloping ahead of Gomez, Thing leaps onto an
old-fashioned door latch and the door swings open INTO

2 INT. GOMEZ AND MORTICIA'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 2

Gomez approaches the bed. Asleep on scarlet satin sheets
is...

MORTICIA

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 3.

2 CONTINUED: 2

GOMEZ
(gazing at Morticia)
Look at her -- I would die for her.
I would kill for her. Either way
-- what bliss.

Low-voiced, incisive, and subtle, with Morticia, smiles
are rare. The ghostly whiteness of her complexion is
offset by the red of the pillowcase upon which her hair
is spread like a diabolic halo. A dark Garbo, sultry
and remote, she's a ruined beauty.

Morticia OPENS HER EYES.

GOMEZ
(adoringly)
Unhappy, darling?

MORTICIA
(passionately)
Oh, yes, yes. Completely.

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A3 OMITTED A3
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a poignant scene, Gomez mourns the long absence of his brother Fester, reflecting on their attempts to reach him amidst dusty memorabilia in Fester's neglected room. Thing, a loyal disembodied hand, guides Gomez to his lavish bedroom where he admires Morticia, professing his willingness to do anything for her. Morticia awakens and reveals her own feelings of unhappiness, adding complexity to their relationship. The scene blends melancholy and dark humor, highlighting Gomez's emotional struggle with loss and his devotion to Morticia.
Strengths
  • Rich character development
  • Emotionally impactful dialogue
  • Eerie and atmospheric setting
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Limited plot progression

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the emotional depth of Gomez's longing for his lost brother and the intense love between Gomez and Morticia. The introduction of Fester's room adds a layer of mystery and nostalgia.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring the Addams Family dynamics, particularly Gomez's longing for his lost brother and his deep love for Morticia, is intriguing and sets up potential conflicts and resolutions.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in this scene is focused on establishing the emotional core of the characters rather than advancing the main storyline. It serves as a crucial moment for character development.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique characters and settings, such as the Addams Family mansion and its eccentric inhabitants. The dialogue is witty and distinctive, capturing the essence of the Addams Family's dark humor and unconventional lifestyle.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Gomez and Morticia are richly portrayed with complex emotions and dynamics. Their interactions reveal layers of their personalities and deepen the audience's connection to them.

Character Changes: 7

Gomez experiences a shift in his emotional state, from deep sorrow over Fester's absence to intense love and adoration for Morticia. This change sets the stage for further character development.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with the possibility that his brother, Fester, may truly be lost after twenty-five years of attempting to contact him. This reflects Gomez's deep desire for closure and understanding of his family's history.

External Goal: 7

Gomez's external goal in this scene is to find a way to connect with Fester, either through spiritual means or by uncovering new clues about his disappearance. This reflects the immediate challenge of dealing with the uncertainty surrounding Fester's fate.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is emotional conflict present in Gomez's longing for Fester and Morticia's mysterious demeanor, the scene lacks overt external conflict. The tension is more internal and emotional.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the uncertainty surrounding Fester's fate and the conflicting beliefs and emotions of the characters. This adds complexity and depth to the story, creating obstacles for the protagonists to overcome.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high in terms of emotional depth, as Gomez grapples with the loss of his brother and the intensity of his love for Morticia. The scene sets up potential conflicts and resolutions.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene doesn't significantly move the main plot forward, it lays the groundwork for future conflicts and resolutions by delving into the emotional core of the characters.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' emotions and motivations. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the characters will react to new developments.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of loss, family, and the supernatural. Gomez's belief in the afterlife and his dedication to his lost brother clash with the harsh reality of Fester's absence and the passage of time.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact due to the poignant portrayal of Gomez's grief and love, as well as the darkly romantic interaction between Gomez and Morticia. It resonates with the audience on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue between Gomez and Morticia is poetic, passionate, and darkly humorous, reflecting their unique relationship. It adds depth to their characters and enhances the scene's emotional impact.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intriguing characters, dark humor, and mysterious plot elements. The dialogue and interactions between characters keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of tension, emotion, and humor. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journeys.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the atmosphere and tone of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure, transitioning smoothly between different locations and characters. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness in building tension and suspense.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes Gomez's emotional state and the theme of loss regarding his brother Fester. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic. While Gomez's monologue conveys his despair, it lacks a sense of urgency or interaction that could heighten the emotional stakes.
  • The visual description of Fester's room is vivid and sets a strong atmosphere, but it could benefit from more specific details that reflect Fester's personality or their shared history. For example, including a specific memento that has a story behind it could deepen the emotional impact.
  • The transition from Gomez's despair to his admiration for Morticia is abrupt. While it showcases his duality, it might feel more organic if there were a moment of reflection or a physical action that connects the two emotions, such as him touching a memento of Fester before turning to Morticia.
  • Morticia's response to Gomez's declaration of love is humorously dark, which fits the Addams tone. However, it could be enhanced by adding a layer of complexity to her character. Perhaps she could express a deeper reason for her unhappiness, hinting at her own struggles or desires.
  • The pacing of the scene feels slightly uneven. The initial buildup of Gomez's sorrow is strong, but the transition to Morticia's response feels rushed. A brief pause or a moment of silence could allow the audience to absorb Gomez's feelings before shifting to Morticia.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Gomez interacts with a specific object in Fester's room, such as picking up a trophy or photo, to evoke memories and deepen the emotional connection.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Gomez and Morticia by incorporating a playful exchange that reflects their relationship dynamics, allowing for a balance of humor and depth.
  • Introduce a physical action or gesture from Gomez that symbolizes his emotional state, such as him pacing or running his fingers over the dust, to visually represent his turmoil.
  • Explore Morticia's character further by giving her a line that hints at her own feelings about Fester's absence, creating a more layered interaction between her and Gomez.
  • Adjust the pacing by including a brief moment of silence or reflection after Gomez's monologue before Morticia responds, allowing the audience to fully grasp the weight of his words.



Scene 3 -  Pugsley's Potion Predicament
3 INT. PUGSLEY'S ROOM - SAME TIME 3

Pugsley crouches on the floor, playing with his kid-sized
chemistry set.

The walls of his room are covered with road signs he's
collected -- "Bridge Out!", "Detour! Excavation Ahead!",
"Dangerous Undertow!", "Keep Clear! High Voltage!"
SAWED-OFF STOP SIGNS, still on their poles, are stacked
in the corner.

In another corner stands a CYLINDRICAL FLOOR-TO-CEILING
FISH TANK, FILLED WITH PIRANHA.

This tubby energetic monster of a nine-year-old boy has
every chance of growing up to be the public monster his
parents would be proud of.

He MIXES chemicals in a beaker. The brew steams. Grin-
ning wickedly, Pugsley SWALLOWS it down.

He contorts, undergoing the beginnings of a transforma-
tion, then SHRINKS to the size of a mouse. Laughing, he
crawls out of his human-size pajamas.

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4 OMITTED 4
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A5 INT. ATTIC - SAME TIME A5

Solemn and mournful, ten-year-old Wednesday has black
hair and white skin like her mother. She sits on a stool
among the stored Addams' family objects, ONE END OF A
STRING TIED TO HER TOOTH, THE OTHER TIED TO A TRAP DOOR.

The trap door is flung open, GRANNY pokes her head
through. She's a giggly hag who looks like she was in
the bathtub when the hairdryer fell in.

Wednesday's pulled tooth swings at the end of the string.

WEDNESDAY
Thank you, Grandmama.

In a foul mood, Granny tromps up into the attic.

GRANNY
You kids are going to have to kill
your own breakfast this morning.

Wednesday opens a cigar box. Inside the box are assorted
human and animal teeth, fangs and dentures, along with a
collection of glass eyes. Wednesday drops her tooth in
the box.

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5 OMITTED 5

A6 INT. GOMEZ AND MORTICIA'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME A6

Gomez takes Morticia in his arms. As she languidly
drapes herself across his chest, she is caught in a
sudden shaft of sunlight. She squints. On the bedside
table beside her, Morticia's OVERSIZED CARNIVOROUS
ORCHID WILTS.

MORTICIA
Gomez... the sun... il me perce
comme un poignard.

GOMEZ
(wildly aroused)
Tish... that's French!

MORTICIA
(nonchalant)
Oui.

GOMEZ
Cara mia!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 5.

A6 CONTINUED: A6

He kisses his way up to her neck, then, suddenly
bursting with enthusiasm and a sense of purpose, LEAPS
from the bed, drawing his bedside saber from its sheath
and BRANDISHING it at the offending beam.

GOMEZ
En garde monsieur sole!

He thrusts and parries, pantomiming a duel with the
shaft of light.

MORTICIA
Gomez?

GOMEZ
Querida?

MORTICIA
Last night, you were... unhinged.
You were like some desperate,
howling demon. You frightened me.
Do it again.

Gomez, instantly aflame.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Fantasy"]

Summary In his whimsical room filled with quirky decorations, nine-year-old Pugsley experiments with his chemistry set, mixing colorful chemicals that produce steam. With a mischievous grin, he drinks the concoction and magically shrinks to the size of a mouse, crawling out of his pajamas and laughing at his transformation.
Strengths
  • Unique blend of dark humor and fantasy elements
  • Effective introduction of characters and setting
  • Witty and engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant conflict or high stakes in the scene

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively establishes the unique tone of the Addams Family universe, combining humor with a touch of melancholy. The eccentricities of the characters are highlighted, setting the stage for the story to unfold.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of blending dark humor with elements of fantasy and eccentricity in a family setting is unique and engaging. It sets the Addams Family apart from traditional family dynamics, creating a world that is both bizarre and captivating.

Plot: 7

While the scene focuses more on character introduction and setting the tone, it lays the groundwork for potential conflicts and developments within the Addams Family. The plot progression is subtle but effective in establishing the family dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene is highly original, with fresh and unconventional situations that showcase the authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-defined and showcase their eccentricities and quirks effectively. Each character's personality shines through, setting the stage for potential character arcs and interactions.

Character Changes: 6

While there are subtle hints at character growth and development, the scene primarily focuses on introducing the characters and their eccentricities. Future scenes may explore deeper character changes.

Internal Goal: 8

Pugsley's internal goal in this scene is to transform himself, reflecting his desire for mischief and exploration of his own abilities.

External Goal: 7

Pugsley's external goal is not explicitly stated in this scene, but it could be inferred as testing the limits of his chemistry set and abilities.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is not a significant conflict in this scene, the underlying tensions and dynamics within the Addams Family hint at potential conflicts to come, adding depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing internal and external challenges that add depth to their interactions.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are not particularly high in this scene, but the eccentricities and dynamics within the Addams Family hint at potential conflicts and challenges that may arise, adding intrigue to the narrative.

Story Forward: 7

The scene sets the stage for future developments within the Addams Family, introducing key characters and establishing the tone and atmosphere of the screenplay. It moves the story forward by laying the groundwork for potential conflicts and interactions.

Unpredictability: 9

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and transformations of the characters, adding a sense of excitement and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between societal norms and the Addams Family's unconventional values. Pugsley's actions challenge the idea of conformity and safety.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, from humor to melancholy, creating a unique emotional impact on the audience. The characters' quirks and interactions add depth to the emotional resonance of the scene.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, darkly humorous, and reflective of the characters' personalities. It adds depth to the interactions and sets the tone for the relationships within the Addams Family.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its unique characters, witty dialogue, and unpredictable situations that keep the audience intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, creating a dynamic rhythm that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is well-executed, with clear descriptions and scene transitions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, effectively transitioning between different character perspectives and locations.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes Pugsley's character as a mischievous and adventurous child, which aligns well with the overall tone of the Addams Family. However, the transformation from a child to a mouse feels abrupt and lacks a clear motivation or context. It would benefit from a stronger setup that hints at why Pugsley is experimenting with his chemistry set in this way.
  • The visual elements, such as the road signs and the piranha tank, are excellent for establishing the darkly comedic atmosphere of the Addams Family. However, the scene could use more dynamic action or interaction to maintain engagement. Pugsley is alone, and while his actions are entertaining, adding another character or a more interactive element could enhance the scene's energy.
  • The dialogue is minimal, which is appropriate for a scene focused on visual gags. However, incorporating some internal thoughts or a brief exchange with Thing could add depth to Pugsley's character and provide insight into his motivations. This would also help to break up the visual monotony and keep the audience engaged.
  • The pacing of the scene is quick, which is good for maintaining momentum, but the transition to Pugsley shrinking feels rushed. A moment of hesitation or a humorous reaction from Pugsley before he drinks the concoction could heighten the comedic effect and allow the audience to connect more with his character.
  • The scene ends with Pugsley crawling out of his pajamas, which is a humorous visual, but it lacks a clear lead-in to the next scene. A more defined transition or a hint at what Pugsley plans to do next could create a smoother flow between scenes.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of dialogue or internal monologue for Pugsley that reflects his excitement or curiosity about his experiment. This could help the audience connect with his character more deeply.
  • Introduce another character, such as Thing or even Wednesday, to interact with Pugsley during the scene. This could create opportunities for humor and enhance the dynamics of the scene.
  • Expand on the moment before Pugsley drinks the potion. A comedic hesitation or a playful warning from Thing could build anticipation and make the transformation more impactful.
  • Provide a clearer transition to the next scene. Perhaps Pugsley could express a desire to explore or cause mischief after his transformation, setting up the next scene's context.
  • Consider using more visual gags or props in the room that could contribute to the humor, such as a humorous warning label on the chemistry set or a playful interaction with the piranhas.



Scene 4 -  Foggy Mishaps and Golfing Antics
6 EXT. ROOFTOP - SAME TIME 6

Granny delivers a swift kick to her fog machine.

GRANNY
Lousy bucket of bolts...!

The FOG MACHINE, straight out of a Jules Verne nightmare,
is malfunctioning this morning, struggling to churn
out its patches of fog.

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7 INT./EXT. MORTICIA AND GOMEZ'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 7

At the window, Gomez pokes his head out. In the
background, Morticia brushes her hair with a silver
filigree brush.

GOMEZ
(disturbed)
Granny - where's your fog?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 5A.

7 CONTINUED: 7

FROM ABOVE

the fog machine hurtles downwards, missing decapitating
Gomez by millimeters. It crashes below, smashing through
the front porch roof.

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8 OMITTED 8

9 INT. ENTRANCE HALL - LATER 9

Standing beside the front door is LURCH, the gigantic
family butler, a reanimated stitched-together behemoth.
He holds two brown paper lunch bags in his enormous
hands. The bags' contents wriggle, eager to escape.

WEDNESDAY
(taking her bag)
Thank you, Lurch.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/6/90 6.

9 CONTINUED: 9

Pugsley takes his bag, opens it, and peers inside. Lurch
GROWLS, and Pugsley closes the bag.

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10 EXT. BALCONY OUTSIDE GOMEZ AND MORTICIA'S BEDROOM - 10
SAME TIME

Gomez is HITTING GOLF BALLS -- Thing serving as his tee
-- while Morticia sips tea.

11 ONE OF THE GOLF BALLS 11

flies with incredible speed

THROUGH THE WINDOW of the ADDAMS' ONLY NEIGHBOR. This
well-tended HOME sits on the hill overlooking the
Addams' Mansion like some Republican sentinel.

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12 INT. NEIGHBOR'S HOME - SAME TIME 12

JUDGE WOMACK, the Addams' CRUSTY PATRICIAN NEIGHBOR, is
having his breakfast when Gomez's golf ball lands in
his cornflakes, shattering the bowl, covering him with
milk.

Judge Womack hurries to his broken window, shaking his
fist:

JUDGE WOMACK
Damn you, Addams!

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13 EXT. GOMEZ AND MORTICIA'S BALCONY - SAME TIME 13

FROM THEIR VANTAGE POINT --

it appears to Gomez and Morticia that Judge Womack is
waving to them. Gomez waves back.

GOMEZ
(calls)
Sorry about the window, Judge!
Keep the ball! I have a whole
bucketful.

He holds up a bucket of golf balls. He tosses his
golfclub to Thing, who DEPOSITS IT in the golfbag.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 7.

13 CONTINUED: 13

Gomez joins Morticia watching

THE DEPARTING SCHOOL BUS.

MORTICIA
The little ones, off to school.
Bless them.

GOMEZ
They grow up so fast, don't they?

MORTICIA
Too fast.

THEIR POV

Tires smoking, the school bus strains to chug down the
road. Gleefully hanging from the rear bumper is
Pugsley, dragging his heels.

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A14 OMITTED A14
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary On the Addams family rooftop, Granny struggles with a malfunctioning fog machine, leading to chaos when it falls and crashes onto the porch. Meanwhile, Gomez playfully hits golf balls, inadvertently sending one into the neighbor Judge Womack's house, ruining his breakfast. Womack angrily confronts the family, who misinterpret his gestures as friendly. The scene captures the whimsical and eccentric nature of the Addams family as they navigate their quirky conflicts, culminating in a lighthearted moment of reflection between Gomez and Morticia about their children growing up.
Strengths
  • Eccentric character interactions
  • Dark humor
  • Unique setting
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant plot progression
  • Low emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams Family with its dark humor and eccentricity, providing both humor and character development.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on the Addams Family's unique lifestyle and interactions, is well-executed and engaging.

Plot: 7

While the plot doesn't significantly progress in this scene, it sets up the eccentricities of the Addams Family and establishes the tone for future events.

Originality: 9

The scene demonstrates a high level of originality through its fresh approach to dark comedy and unconventional family dynamics. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric personalities, adding depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in this scene, as it mainly focuses on showcasing the characters' eccentricities.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to maintain a sense of normalcy and control amidst the chaos and eccentricities of their family life. This reflects their deeper need for stability and acceptance of their unconventional lifestyle.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to navigate the challenges and mishaps that arise from their family's unique behaviors and interactions. This reflects the immediate circumstances and obstacles they face in their daily lives.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is no major conflict in this scene, the tension between the Addams Family's eccentricity and the outside world adds a layer of conflict.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters like Judge Womack providing a challenge to the Addams family's unconventional lifestyle. The audience is left wondering how the conflict will be resolved.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and character dynamics.

Story Forward: 7

The scene sets up the tone and establishes the eccentricities of the Addams Family, laying the groundwork for future events.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the plot, such as the malfunctioning fog machine and the golf ball incident. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between societal norms and individuality. Characters like Judge Womack represent traditional values and expectations, while the Addams family embodies nonconformity and self-expression. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in acceptance and authenticity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits humor and amusement rather than deep emotional impact, fitting the tone of the story.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty and sarcastic, reflecting the dark humor of the Addams Family and adding to the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mix of humor, suspense, and character dynamics. The unexpected events and interactions keep the audience entertained and invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of humor, tension, and character development. The rhythm keeps the audience engaged and maintains a sense of momentum.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of this scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with proper scene headings and descriptions. It enhances the readability and flow of the screenplay.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear transitions between locations and characters. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the Addams family's dark humor and whimsical nature, particularly through Granny's frustration with the fog machine and Gomez's obliviousness to the chaos around him. However, the transition between the rooftop and the interior scenes could be smoother to maintain the flow of action.
  • The visual gags, such as the fog machine malfunctioning and the golf ball crashing through Judge Womack's window, are strong comedic elements. However, the scene could benefit from more character-driven dialogue to enhance the interactions and deepen the audience's connection to the characters.
  • Gomez's interaction with Morticia is charming, but it feels somewhat disconnected from the chaos happening outside. Integrating their dialogue more closely with the events on the rooftop could create a stronger sense of urgency and humor.
  • The scene introduces Judge Womack as a potential antagonist, but his character could be fleshed out further. Adding a line or two that hints at his history with the Addams family would provide context and enhance the comedic tension.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the cut to the neighbor's home feels abrupt. A brief moment of tension or anticipation before the golf ball crashes could heighten the comedic payoff.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line of dialogue from Granny that reflects her personality and frustration with the fog machine, which could enhance her character and provide a humorous contrast to the other family members.
  • Integrate more physical comedy between Gomez and Morticia, such as Gomez accidentally hitting something else with his golf swing, to create a more cohesive comedic rhythm throughout the scene.
  • Introduce a brief moment where Judge Womack reacts to the chaos before the golf ball hits him, allowing the audience to anticipate the comedic outcome and build tension.
  • Explore the possibility of having Pugsley or Wednesday interact with the fog machine, adding another layer of chaos and showcasing their mischievous nature.
  • Consider ending the scene with a humorous callback to the fog machine, perhaps with Granny vowing to fix it in a ridiculous way, to tie the scene together and leave the audience with a memorable punchline.



Scene 5 -  A Pruning of Roses and Gates
B14 INT. THE CONSERVATORY - LATER THAT MORNING B14

Morticia, wearing gardening gloves, is snipping the
blossoms off her roses.

Gomez sits at a table, playing CHESS with Thing.

GOMEZ
It's a milestone, Tish. This very
evening -- our twenty-fifth seance.
All those years, gnawed by guilt,
undone by woe, burning with
uncertainty...

MORTICIA
(yearningly)
Oh Gomez, don't torture yourself.
That's my job.

GOMEZ
(lustfully)
Tish...

MORTICIA
Imagine, Darling, if Fester did
come back. Half-alive, barely
human, a rotting shell...

GOMEZ
Don't tease.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 8.

14 EXT. JUST OUTSIDE THE ADDAMS' GROUNDS - SAME TIME 14

TULLY ALFORD, the family attorney, and his wife, MARGARET,
approach "GATE," a wrought-iron monstrosity that opens of
its own accord. Though Tully comes here often and
Margaret has been here before, they never cease to be
startled by "Gate."

Tully has a puffy, once handsome face, and an embittered
grey aura that is the mark of a middle-age misspent.
High-strung and superficial, Margaret is more disap-
pointed in Tully than he is in himself.

Margaret passes through Gate first. Then, as Tully passes
through, Gate slams on him, clipping him and catching the
end of his coat. Tully fights Gate for his coat.

TULLY
Let me go!

Ignoring Tully, Margaret continues stiffly up the walk.

TULLY
(to Gate)
Gimme that! Stop it! I'm warning
you! It's not a good day!

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A15 INT. CONSERVATORY - SAME TIME A15

Gomez moves a chess piece. Thing gestures out the window.
Gomez and Morticia both look out. As they do, Thing
moves two chess pieces, cheating.

MORTICIA
(looking out)
Tully is here, darling.

GOMEZ
Ha! That Tully.

MORTICIA
Romping with Gate.

GOMEZ
(moving a piece)
Check.

Thing moves another piece and gestures in triumph.

MORTICIA
(impressed)
Checkmate.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/26/90 8A.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family's conservatory, Morticia playfully prunes her roses while Gomez expresses guilt about their upcoming twenty-fifth seance. They fantasize about the return of Fester, adding a darkly comedic tone to their flirtation. Outside, Tully Alford struggles with the ominous wrought-iron gate, symbolizing his frustrations, while his unimpressed wife Margaret walks ahead. The scene blends whimsical elements with absurdity, culminating in Gomez and Morticia's acknowledgment of Tully's arrival.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Witty dialogue
  • Consistent tone and atmosphere
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant conflict
  • Limited character changes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams Family with its dark humor, eccentric characters, and supernatural elements. The dialogue is witty and engaging, and the tone is consistent throughout.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a dysfunctional yet loving family like the Addams is well-executed in this scene. It explores themes of love, loss, and eccentricity in a unique and engaging way.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene revolves around the Addams Family dynamics, particularly Gomez's longing for his missing brother Fester. It sets up conflicts and relationships that will likely unfold in the rest of the screenplay.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and original situations, such as the Addams Family's unique traditions and values, and presents authentic character actions and dialogue that reflect their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in this scene are well-defined and stay true to their eccentric and darkly humorous personalities. Each character contributes to the overall tone and dynamics of the Addams Family.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it sets up potential growth and development for characters like Gomez and Morticia as they navigate their relationships and family dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal is to maintain her role as the dark and mysterious matriarch of the family, while also expressing her love and devotion to Gomez.

External Goal: 7.5

Gomez's external goal is to enjoy the upcoming seance and continue the family traditions, despite the challenges and uncertainties they face.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are hints of conflict, such as Gomez's despair over Fester's absence, the scene is more focused on establishing the characters and their relationships.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts between characters and external challenges that create tension and uncertainty for the audience.

High Stakes: 6

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, there is a sense of emotional investment and longing, particularly in Gomez's search for his missing brother Fester.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing key relationships, conflicts, and themes that will likely play out in the rest of the screenplay. It sets the stage for further developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' interactions and the dark humor that adds an element of surprise.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams Family's unique values and beliefs about death, love, and family. Morticia's yearning for darkness and Gomez's lustful nature create a tension between their desires and the reality of their situation.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, from humor to melancholy, as it delves into the Addams Family dynamics and relationships. There is a sense of longing and love that adds depth to the characters.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in this scene is witty, sarcastic, and filled with dark humor. It effectively conveys the personalities of the characters and advances the plot.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its unique characters, witty dialogue, and dark humor that keep the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and description to maintain the audience's interest and drive the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character actions, and dialogue that are easy to follow.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character motivations, conflict, and resolution that drive the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, particularly through the playful banter between Gomez and Morticia. Their dialogue is witty and reflects their unique relationship, which is a strong point of the scene.
  • The transition from the conservatory to the outside with Tully and Margaret is a clever way to juxtapose the Addams family's eccentricity with the more mundane world. However, the shift could be smoother; the abrupt cut to Tully's struggle with the gate feels slightly disjointed from the previous conversation.
  • Morticia's line about torturing Gomez is a great example of the dark humor that defines the Addams Family. However, the subsequent line about Fester could be more impactful if it included a more vivid description or a specific memory that highlights their relationship with him, rather than just stating he would be a 'rotting shell.'
  • The chess game serves as a metaphor for the strategic and often playful nature of Gomez and Morticia's relationship, but it could be enhanced by incorporating more visual elements or actions that reflect the stakes of their conversation. For instance, showing Gomez's intense focus on the game while discussing Fester could add depth to his emotional turmoil.
  • Thing's actions are a delightful addition, providing a visual gag that complements the dialogue. However, the cheating aspect could be emphasized more, perhaps with Gomez reacting to it in a humorous way, which would further showcase the family's quirky dynamics.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Gomez reflects on a specific memory of Fester that evokes a stronger emotional response, enhancing the audience's connection to the character.
  • Smooth the transition between the conservatory and Tully's entrance by incorporating a line or action that connects the two scenes, perhaps by having Gomez comment on Tully's arrival before the cut.
  • Enhance the chess metaphor by having Gomez make a particularly bold move that reflects his feelings about Fester, perhaps paralleling his emotional state with the game.
  • Include a humorous reaction from Gomez when Thing cheats at chess, which could serve to highlight the playful nature of their relationship and add an extra layer of comedy.
  • Consider expanding Morticia's description of Fester to include a more vivid or specific detail that reflects her feelings about him, making the line more memorable and impactful.



Scene 6 -  Frustrations at the Addams Gate
B15 EXT. GATE - SAME TIME B15

MARGARET
Tully! Can't you keep up?

TULLY
I'm trying...

Tully rips his coat to get it away from Gate.

MARGARET
These are your last paying clients,
may I remind you!

TULLY
If it gives you pleasure...

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/28/91 9.

B15 CONTINUED: B15

MARGARET
Something has to. Like a decent
coat - something dressy, for evening.
Ask-for a loan. Beg.

TULLY
No loans! I'm not a bum.
(before Margaret
can reply)
Don't say it. I'll get the money,
I've got a plan.

MARGARET
This is all so humiliating. Why
did I marry you?

TULLY
Because I said yes.

Margaret marches on toward the front door, skirting the fog
machine as if it had every reason to be there. It hisses
at Tully as he passes, splattering his trousers with fog.

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C15 INT. ENTRY HALL - A LITTLE LATER C15

Tully hands his hat to Lurch and marches off toward
Gomez's study. Finding herself alone with Lurch,
Margaret is more nervous and intimidated than she would
ever admit.

MARGARET
I'm here to see Mrs. Addams. About
the charity auction.

Growling, Lurch heads for the stairs. Screwing up her
courage, Margaret resolutely follows.

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15 INT. ADDAMS FAMILY PORTRAIT GALLERY - A LITTLE LATER 15

Tully stalks glumly along the hall and past the family
portraits -- generations of Addams grotesques in
elaborate gilt frames heading toward the imposing doors
of Gomez's study.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 10.

15 CONTINUED: 15

ON THE FLOOR

lies a BEAR RUG eyes and mouth open.

Tully, preoccupied, strides toward the rug. There's a
sudden FEROCIOUS GROWL as he steps on it.

TULLY
Damn!

He kicks at the rug. It BITES him, clamping its jaws
onto his trouser cuff. He flails, dancing around,
finally managing to shake it off. He finds himself
FACE-TO-FACE with one of the paintings...

A PORTRAIT OF THE TEENAGE FESTER ADDAMS

draped in black crepe and HOLDING A LIT CANDLE, though
how it is holding a lit candle is an utter mystery. At
fifteen, Fester was utterly hairless with a dead white
complexion and eyes rimmed in black like a raccoon's.
The identifying plaque reads "Fester Addams, 1947 - ?"

TULLY

regards the portrait intently, almost as if having a
premonition.

THE INTRICATELY CARVED DOORS TO GOMEZ'S STUDY

creak open, interrupting the reverie. Girding himself,
Tully proceeds inside.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Horror","Fantasy"]

Summary Margaret and Tully stand outside the Addams family gate, where Margaret expresses her frustration over their financial struggles and Tully's inability to keep up. Tully insists he has a plan to earn money without begging, but Margaret feels humiliated and questions their marriage. Their exchange is laced with humor, highlighting their strained relationship. As they part ways, Tully encounters a bear rug that unexpectedly bites him, prompting him to reflect on a portrait of teenage Fester Addams before entering Gomez's study.
Strengths
  • Effective blend of comedy and horror elements
  • Strong character development
  • Intriguing introduction of new character
Weaknesses
  • Limited emotional depth in the scene
  • Some dialogue may feel forced or cliched

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends comedy, horror, and fantasy elements, setting up intrigue and introducing conflict with the arrival of Tully Alford. The dark humor and eccentricities of the Addams Family are well portrayed.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of introducing a new character, Tully Alford, and exploring the dynamics between him and the Addams Family is intriguing. The scene sets up future conflicts and developments well.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses with the introduction of Tully Alford and hints at deeper mysteries within the Addams Family history. The scene sets up future events and conflicts effectively.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces unique characters and situations within a familiar gothic setting, adding fresh twists to the comedic interactions and conflicts.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters, both existing members of the Addams Family and the new character Tully Alford, are well-developed and showcase their unique personalities and quirks. The interactions between characters add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the introduction of Tully Alford hints at potential developments and shifts in dynamics within the Addams Family.

Internal Goal: 8

Tully's internal goal in this scene is to prove himself to Margaret and maintain his dignity despite their financial struggles. This reflects his deeper need for respect and validation.

External Goal: 7

Tully's external goal is to secure money for a decent coat and avoid humiliation. This reflects the immediate challenge of his financial situation and the pressure from Margaret.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between Tully Alford and the Addams Family is subtly introduced, adding tension and intrigue to the scene. The clash of personalities and motives creates conflict.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene, such as Tully's pride and Margaret's practicality, creates conflict and uncertainty, adding depth to the character dynamics.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderately high in this scene, as the arrival of Tully Alford introduces potential conflicts and challenges for the Addams Family. The mysterious past of the family adds to the stakes.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, characters, and mysteries. It sets up future events and developments within the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected events, such as the bear rug coming to life, adding a layer of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around Tully's pride and refusal to accept help versus Margaret's practicality and willingness to seek assistance. This challenges Tully's beliefs about self-sufficiency and the importance of appearances.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including humor, fear, and curiosity. The eccentricities of the characters and the mysterious atmosphere contribute to the emotional impact.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and captures the dark humor of the Addams Family. It effectively conveys the personalities of the characters and sets the tone for the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to the dynamic interactions between characters, the darkly comedic tone, and the unfolding of the plot within the unique setting.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, with a balance of dialogue and action that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to industry standards, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character interactions and progression of events, maintaining the expected format for its genre.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Margaret and Tully effectively establishes their strained relationship, but it could benefit from more subtext. Their exchanges feel somewhat surface-level, lacking deeper emotional resonance. For instance, Tully's insistence on not being a bum could be expanded to reveal more about his pride and desperation.
  • The scene's pacing is uneven, particularly with Tully's struggle with the gate. While it serves as a comedic moment, it could be tightened to maintain momentum. The transition from the gate to the entry hall feels abrupt; a smoother transition could enhance the flow.
  • The visual elements, such as the fog machine and the bear rug, add to the quirky atmosphere of the Addams family, but they could be more integrated into the narrative. For example, the bear rug biting Tully is humorous, but it could also serve as a metaphor for his situation—caught in a trap of his own making.
  • Margaret's character comes across as frustrated and demanding, but her motivations could be clearer. Why is she so insistent on Tully asking for a loan? Adding a line or two that hints at her own insecurities or desires could make her more relatable.
  • The introduction of the portrait of Fester is intriguing, but it feels disconnected from the rest of the scene. It could be more impactful if Tully's reaction to the portrait tied back to his current predicament, perhaps hinting at a deeper connection to Fester's fate.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more layers to Tully and Margaret's dialogue to reveal their inner thoughts and feelings. This could involve flashbacks or memories that inform their current situation.
  • Tighten the pacing by reducing the time spent on Tully's struggle with the gate. Perhaps he could have a quick, humorous exchange with Margaret while he frees himself, maintaining the comedic tone without dragging the scene.
  • Integrate the bear rug and fog machine more meaningfully into the narrative. For example, Tully could make a comment about the rug that reflects his own feelings of being trapped, enhancing the thematic depth.
  • Clarify Margaret's motivations by adding a line that hints at her own aspirations or fears. This could create a more sympathetic portrayal and deepen the audience's understanding of her character.
  • Make Tully's encounter with the portrait of Fester more significant by connecting it to his current emotional state. Perhaps he could express a fleeting sense of kinship or fear, foreshadowing future events in the story.



Scene 7 -  A Duel of Wit and Blades
16 INT. GOMEZ'S STUDY - SAME TIME 16

A SABER

slices through the air, its blade glinting.

TULLY'S HAND

grabs for the hilt of the sword. He misses.

THE BLADE

embeds in the wall with a thunk. It SHUDDERS.

GOMEZ
Missed.

He leaps into frame, brandishing a saber.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 11.

16 CONTINUED: 16

Tully BACK-PEDALS and, as he PULLS the sword from the
wall, POINTS TO something behind Gomez.

TULLY
What's that?!

Gomez turns to see and Tully CHARGES, wielding the sword
as if he means to decapitate Gomez. But Gomez easily
PARRIES the blow.

GOMEZ
Dirty pool, old man! I like it!

Gomez counters, driving Tully back. He shreds Tully's
jacket.

TULLY
Had enough?

They continue to fence. Gomez flips Tully's briefcase
open and a sheaf of legal looking papers spills out.

GOMEZ
Where's my pen? Never mind, I'll
use yours.

His blade finds the pen in Tully's inside jacket pocket.
He does HANDSPRINGS back to his desk, landing gracefully
in his chair.

GOMEZ
First, the old business!

He swivels, warding off another blow, then cavalierly
continues the duel as he signs the LEGAL DOCUMENTS
scattered before him.

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17 INT. ADDAMS ATTIC - SAME TIME 17

Morticia, Granny, and Margaret sort through Addams'
possessions. In trunks. Boxed. Stacked. Covered with
shrouds. Morticia opens a gigantic, elaborately carved
armoire.

MORTICIA
Perhaps it's in here.

GRANNY
(mischievously)
I don't think so...

In the front of the armoire is an overstuffed GARMENT BAG
LABELLED 'UNCLE NIKNAK'S WINTER CLOTHES.'
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/6/90 12.

17 CONTINUED: 17

MORTICIA
(full of fond
memories)
Uncle Niknak's winter wardrobe...

She carefully passes the garment bag to Granny who
chucks it aside.

The next garment bag is marked 'UNCLE NIKNAK'S SUMMER
CLOTHES.'

MORTICIA
Uncle Niknak's summer wardrobe...

She passes this garment bag to Granny who chucks it aside
also.

Next in the armoire is a BODY BAG.

MORTICIA
(fonder still)
Uncle Niknak.

Morticia continues going through the armoire.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Fantasy"]

Summary In Gomez's study, a playful duel unfolds between Gomez and Tully as Tully attempts to grab a saber but misses, embedding it in the wall. Gomez mocks him and engages in a light-hearted sword fight, easily parrying Tully's frantic attacks while humorously searching for a pen among Tully's belongings. He finds it in Tully's jacket pocket and performs a handspring back to his desk, signing legal documents while fending off Tully's efforts. The scene is filled with comedic banter and exaggerated swordplay, showcasing Gomez's confidence and Tully's desperation.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Eccentric and engaging characters
Weaknesses
  • Potential lack of emotional depth in some moments
  • Limited exploration of high stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, dark elements, and character dynamics to create an engaging and entertaining sequence.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene revolves around humor, dark comedy, and character exploration, all of which are effectively portrayed and contribute to the overall tone of the screenplay.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene focuses on introducing conflict between Gomez and Tully, as well as exploring the eccentricities of the Addams Family through the discovery of Uncle Niknak's wardrobe. While not heavily plot-driven, the scene serves to develop character dynamics and set up future events.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a sword fight combined with signing legal documents, creating a fresh and unexpected scenario. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in this scene are well-developed and showcase their unique personalities, quirks, and relationships. The interactions between Gomez, Tully, Morticia, Granny, and Margaret add depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 7

The characters, especially Gomez and Tully, undergo subtle changes in their dynamics and relationships throughout the scene, setting up potential growth and development in future interactions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to enjoy the sword fight and have fun with Tully. It reflects his desire for excitement and unconventional activities.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to sign the legal documents while engaging in the sword fight. It reflects the immediate challenge of multitasking and maintaining focus.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Gomez and Tully, as well as the internal conflicts within the Addams Family, create tension and drive the scene forward, keeping the audience engaged.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Tully providing a challenge to Gomez during the sword fight, creating suspense and uncertainty.

High Stakes: 6

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, the conflicts and interactions set the stage for potential consequences and developments in the story.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, developing character relationships, and setting up future events, keeping the narrative engaging and dynamic.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected combination of sword fighting and signing legal documents, keeping the audience on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict is between the traditional idea of signing legal documents with seriousness and the Addams Family's playful approach to it through sword fighting. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs about how tasks should be approached.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

While the scene is more focused on humor and dark comedy, there are moments of nostalgia and emotional depth, particularly in the exploration of Uncle Niknak's wardrobe.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, capturing the distinct voices of each character and enhancing the comedic tone of the screenplay.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic sword fight, witty dialogue, and the juxtaposition of serious tasks with playful behavior.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension during the sword fight and maintaining the audience's interest.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with concise descriptions and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre of dark comedy, with a balance of action, dialogue, and character interactions.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the playful and absurd nature of the Addams Family, showcasing Gomez's flamboyant personality and Tully's desperation. However, the humor relies heavily on physical comedy and swordplay, which may not resonate with all audiences. The dialogue is witty but could benefit from more character depth to enhance the stakes of the duel.
  • The pacing of the scene is brisk, which works well for the comedic tone, but it may leave some viewers wanting more context or emotional weight behind the characters' actions. Tully's motivations for charging at Gomez could be clearer, as it currently feels somewhat arbitrary.
  • The transition from the duel to the cutaway to Morticia and Granny feels abrupt. While it serves to juxtapose the chaos in Gomez's study with the more subdued activity in the attic, it could be smoother. A line or action that ties the two scenes together could enhance the flow.
  • Gomez's character shines through his playful banter and acrobatics, but Tully's character lacks a strong presence. His reactions and dialogue could be more pronounced to create a better contrast with Gomez's confidence and flamboyance. This would help establish Tully as a more formidable opponent, even if he is ultimately outmatched.
  • The visual elements, such as the saber embedding in the wall and the legal documents spilling out, are effective in creating a chaotic atmosphere. However, the scene could benefit from more descriptive language to paint a clearer picture of the setting and the characters' movements, enhancing the reader's immersion.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two of dialogue that clarifies Tully's motivations for attacking Gomez. This could provide more context and make the scene feel more cohesive.
  • Introduce a moment of tension or stakes during the duel, such as Tully expressing frustration over his financial situation or his relationship with Margaret, to give the audience a reason to care about the outcome.
  • Smooth the transition between the duel and the attic scene by incorporating a line from Gomez that hints at the chaos in the house, creating a thematic link between the two locations.
  • Enhance Tully's character by giving him a memorable quip or reaction during the duel that showcases his personality, making him feel more like an equal foil to Gomez.
  • Use more vivid descriptions of the setting and the characters' actions to create a stronger visual impact. This could involve detailing the clutter in Gomez's study or the way Tully's movements reflect his desperation.



Scene 8 -  Dueling Proposals
18 INT. GOMEZ'S STUDY - SAME TIME 18

Gomez and Tully are still duelling. Still signing. Gomez
hasn't even broken a sweat.

GOMEZ
I wish you'd drop by more
often.

Tully doggedly fights on. His jacket has suffered more
shredding from Gomez's blade.

TULLY
I'm like to, but...

GOMEZ
But what, old sport?

TULLY
Oh, you know...

GOMEZ
You know what?

TULLY
I'm a bleeder.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 13.

18 CONTINUED: 18

Gomez STOPS DEAD at a document. Deftly, he DISARMS Tully,
sending his saber flying up and out of view.

GOMEZ
What's this? A new proposal? "The
Fester Addams Off-Shore Retirement
Fund?" What would they do?

TULLY
What wouldn't they do? It's a very
worthy cause and a great addition to
the other Fester Addams Funds.

GOMEZ
(rhapsodizes)
Fester - all tribute to thee. Some
called him inhumanly evil.

TULLY
(protesting)
No!

GOMEZ
Only our parents. I called him -
brother.

TULLY
And his memory must live on, forever.
Through money. We'll deposit the
funds under my name, for tax purposes.

GOMEZ
Really? That's inspired!

TULLY
He would have wanted it that way.
Beloved Fester.

The sword tumbles back into his hand. They resume
duelling.

GOMEZ
Indeed! For Fester!

TULLY
For Fester! A brother!

GOMEZ
My brother!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 14.

18 CONTINUED: (2) 18
TULLY
One of a kind!

GOMEZ
The doctors all said!

TULLY
Kind to animals! So good with
children!

GOMEZ
They never proved anything.

TULLY
One million dollars. The perfect
amount.

GOMEZ
It's brilliant!

TULLY
It's untraceable.

GOMEZ
But, Tully, it's not old business.
It's going to have to wait. You
know the rules better than that.

TULLY
(taken aback)
What? But this is different! It's
in my name! Make an exception!

GOMEZ
Old business is old business and
new business is new business and
this...

Gomez holds up the proposal.

GOMEZ (cont'd)
... is new business and we don't
discuss new business again until...

With one finger, he rifles through a desk calendar,
flipping endless pages. He lands on a distant date...

GOMEZ
Next quarter! Next quarter!?

Tully has gone white.

TULLY
Next quarter!?

Tully goes to attack like an enraged bull.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 15.

18 CONTINUED: (3) 18

Gomez does a KUNG FU BACK FLIP out of his chair -- just
missing being run through by Tully's saber. The saber
skewers the overstuffed chair, and carried by the momentum
of the charge, Tully SOMERSAULTS over the desk, colliding
with the chair, landing on the floor.

GOMEZ
Fine lunge, but your riposte -
a tad rusty.

Gomez carelessly flings away his sword.

Thing, perched on a decorative Samurai helmet, plucks the
sword from the air and resheathes it.

GOMEZ
Make yourself comfortable, old man,
while I get the money for the monthly
expenses.

Tully lies, ruined, on the floor.

Gomez GRABS TULLY'S BRIEFCASE and makes a brisk exit,
closing the office doors behind him.

Tully crawls to the doors and slides them open a crack,
intent on spying on Gomez. He PEEKS INTO:

19 OMITTED 19
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In Gomez's study, a playful duel unfolds between Gomez and Tully as they discuss the 'Fester Addams Off-Shore Retirement Fund.' Despite being disarmed, Tully passionately pushes for the proposal, while Gomez reminisces about their late relative, Fester. Tensions rise when Gomez insists on waiting until the next quarter to discuss new business, leading to Tully's frustrated attack. Gomez skillfully evades Tully's charge with a kung fu backflip, leaving Tully defeated on the floor as Gomez departs to gather funds.
Strengths
  • Sharp dialogue
  • Humorous interactions
  • Dynamic character relationships
Weaknesses
  • Limited emotional depth
  • Lack of significant plot advancement

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written with clever dialogue, comedic elements, and a touch of dark humor that aligns with the Addams Family's eccentric nature. The sword fight adds an entertaining physical element to the scene, keeping the audience engaged.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on a humorous sword fight and the introduction of a new business proposal, aligns well with the tone and style of the Addams Family franchise. It adds depth to the characters and advances the plot in an engaging way.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the introduction of the new business proposal and the interaction between Gomez and Tully. While it doesn't significantly advance the main storyline, it adds depth to the characters and sets up future conflicts and developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and original take on family dynamics and financial intrigue, combining elements of dark comedy with heartfelt moments of loyalty and remembrance. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams Family universe.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Gomez and Tully are well-developed in this scene, showcasing their personalities, relationships, and motivations. Their witty banter and physical interactions add depth to their dynamic and entertain the audience.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it deepens the relationship between Gomez and Tully and sets the stage for future developments. Their interactions reveal more about their personalities and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to honor the memory of Fester Addams and ensure his legacy lives on. This reflects Gomez's deep love and loyalty to his family, as well as his desire to maintain their unconventional traditions.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to handle the financial proposal for the Fester Addams Off-Shore Retirement Fund. This reflects the immediate challenge of managing the family's finances and honoring Fester's memory.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Gomez and Tully, though lighthearted and comedic, adds tension and intrigue to the scene. Their sword fight and verbal sparring create a dynamic conflict that keeps the audience engaged.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting values and goals driving the conflict between the characters. The uncertainty of the outcome adds tension and suspense to the scene.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes in the scene are moderate, revolving around the new business proposal and the interaction between Gomez and Tully. While there is tension and conflict, it is presented in a lighthearted and comedic manner.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new business proposal related to Fester Addams and showcasing the dynamic between Gomez and Tully. It sets up future conflicts and plot developments, adding depth to the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the characters' actions and dialogue, keeping the audience on their toes and engaged in the unfolding drama.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the values of family loyalty and financial responsibility. Gomez prioritizes honoring Fester's memory and maintaining family traditions, while Tully focuses on practical financial matters and tax purposes.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, primarily through the humor and wit displayed by the characters. While it doesn't evoke deep emotions, it entertains the audience and enhances the eccentric charm of the Addams Family members.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue in the scene is sharp, witty, and filled with humor. It effectively conveys the personalities of Gomez and Tully, adding depth to their characters and engaging the audience with clever wordplay and banter.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dynamic dialogue, dramatic action, and emotional depth. The interactions between the characters and the unfolding plot keep the audience invested and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and character development, maintaining a steady rhythm and flow that keeps the audience engaged and invested in the story.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, character actions, and dialogue cues. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear and engaging structure, balancing dialogue, action, and character development effectively. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's overall effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively maintains the comedic tone established in previous scenes, showcasing the playful dynamic between Gomez and Tully. However, the humor could be enhanced by incorporating more physical comedy or visual gags during the duel, as the dialogue-driven humor may not fully capture the audience's attention.
  • The dialogue is witty and captures the essence of the characters, particularly Gomez's flamboyant personality and Tully's desperation. However, some lines feel a bit repetitive, especially regarding their admiration for Fester. Streamlining these exchanges could help maintain pacing and keep the audience engaged.
  • The stakes in this scene could be raised further. While Tully's frustration about the proposal is clear, the urgency of the situation could be emphasized more. Perhaps Tully could reveal a more personal reason for needing the funds, adding depth to his character and increasing tension.
  • The transition from the duel to the discussion about the 'Fester Addams Off-Shore Retirement Fund' feels slightly abrupt. A smoother segue could enhance the flow of the scene, perhaps by having Tully momentarily distracted by the duel before he brings up the proposal.
  • The physicality of the duel is entertaining, but it could benefit from more descriptive action. For instance, detailing the movements and reactions of both characters during the fight could create a more vivid and engaging visual experience for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Incorporate more physical comedy during the duel, such as exaggerated movements or unexpected mishaps that could lead to humorous outcomes.
  • Streamline the dialogue to avoid repetition and maintain a brisk pace, ensuring that each line adds value to the character development or plot progression.
  • Consider adding a personal stake for Tully regarding the proposal, which could create a more compelling conflict and deepen his character.
  • Create a smoother transition between the duel and the discussion of the proposal, perhaps by having Tully momentarily distracted by the fight before pivoting to the business discussion.
  • Enhance the action descriptions during the duel to provide a clearer visual picture of the characters' movements and reactions, making the scene more dynamic.



Scene 9 -  Secrets and Greed
A20 INT. DEN - SAME TIME A20

At one of the floor-to-ceiling bookshelves, Gomez reaches
for A BOOK, pulling it partway from the shelf. We see the
book's title - GREED. The entire shelf -- a secret panel --
revolves and deposits Gomez on the other side of the wall.
Then it turns back to its original position.

Tully gets to his feet, goes through the doors, and
staggers for the bookcase.

FROM BEHIND THE BOOKCASE COME THE SOUNDS OF GOMEZ MAKING
HIS DESCENT INTO THE VAULT. CREAKING, GROANING, THE SOUNDS
OF CHAINS AND PULLEYS, VAGUE ANIMAL HOWLS, SPLASHING WATER.

CUT TO:

B20 INT. ATTIC - SAME TIME B20

The armoire has been totally emptied. Morticia looks over
the contents of a nearby shelf. Thing sits on the shelf,
offering a BEJEWELED TREASURE.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 16.

B20 CONTINUED: B20

MORTICIA
There it is. Just what we've been
searching for.
(takes the treasure
from Thing)
Thank you, Thing.

Morticia passes Margaret the JEWEL-ENCRUSTED CYLINDER OF
WEBBED GOLD, dragons' heads with gaping jaws at either end.
Margaret is at first afraid to touch it, but greed helps
her get over it.

MARGARET
(awed)
My God, what is it?

MORTICIA
A family heirloom. A finger trap
from the court of Emperor Wu.

MARGARET
It must be worth a fortune. Look
at those emeralds.
(superciliously)
Oh, Morticia, this is too
extravagant! Even for the auction!

GRANNY
Let's keep it.

MORTICIA
Hush - it's for charity. Widows
and orphans. We need more of them.
Margaret?

Enchanted by the object, Margaret isn't listening. She
inserts her fingers and they're instantly stuck.

MARGARET
(struggling)
Mmm?

MORTICIA
The seance - tonight. Won't you
come? It's Gomez, I'm terribly
worried. He won't eat, he can't
sleep, he's been coughing up
blood...

MARGARET
(aghast)
He coughs up blood?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 17.

B20 CONTINUED: (2) B20

MORTICIA
(sadly)
Well... not like he used to...

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a dual setting of the Addams family home, Gomez secretly accesses a hidden vault by pulling a book titled 'GREED', while Tully spies on him. In the attic, Morticia discovers a bejeweled treasure with Thing's help and presents it to Margaret, who is initially hesitant but becomes enchanted. Morticia emphasizes the treasure's significance for charity, contrasting with Granny's suggestion to keep it. As Margaret struggles to free her fingers from the treasure, Morticia expresses concern for Gomez's health, revealing he has been coughing up blood, highlighting the tension between greed and familial care.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Unique and intriguing elements like the finger trap heirloom
  • Consistent tone and humor
Weaknesses
  • Limited emotional depth
  • Moderate conflict level

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, character interactions, and plot development while maintaining a consistent tone and introducing intriguing elements.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of introducing a valuable heirloom with a dark twist fits well within the overall tone of the screenplay. It adds depth to the characters and sets up potential conflicts and developments.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses through character interactions, the introduction of the finger trap heirloom, and hints at future events like the seance. It sets up intrigue and potential conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique elements such as hidden passages, extravagant heirlooms, and dark humor. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and original, adding depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, each showcasing their unique quirks and personalities. Their interactions drive the scene forward and add depth to the overall story.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it sets up potential growth and conflicts for the characters, especially with the introduction of the finger trap heirloom.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain the family's reputation and legacy, as well as to ensure the well-being of her husband, Gomez. This reflects her deep-seated need for stability, security, and connection within her family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to prepare for a charity auction and ensure the success of the event. This reflects the immediate challenge of managing the family's assets and reputation in the public eye.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are hints of conflict, especially with Tully's greed and the introduction of the finger trap heirloom, the scene focuses more on character interactions and setting up future events.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts arising from internal and external goals, as well as philosophical differences among the characters. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in this scene, with hints of greed, family dynamics, and potential conflicts, setting the stage for future developments.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new elements, advancing character relationships, and setting up future events like the seance.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to its mix of dark humor, unexpected plot developments, and eccentric character choices. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of greed, extravagance, and charity. It challenges the protagonist's values of family loyalty, generosity, and empathy.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits humor and intrigue rather than deep emotional responses, setting the stage for future developments.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, fitting the tone of the scene and revealing insights into the characters' relationships and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of mystery, humor, and character dynamics. The unexpected twists and quirky details keep the audience intrigued and invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and description. It maintains a steady rhythm that keeps the audience engaged and invested in the story.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, character actions, and dialogue cues. It maintains a smooth flow and readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with distinct settings, character interactions, and thematic development. It effectively sets up conflicts and resolutions within the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively transitions between two locations, maintaining a sense of urgency and intrigue as Gomez descends into the vault while Morticia interacts with Margaret. However, the connection between these two actions could be more explicitly drawn to enhance the narrative flow.
  • The dialogue is witty and captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family. Morticia's line about Gomez's health adds a layer of concern that contrasts with the otherwise light-hearted tone, but it could be more impactful if it were foreshadowed earlier in the scene.
  • Margaret's initial hesitation to touch the treasure is a nice touch, showcasing her character's conflict between greed and fear. However, her quick transition to being enchanted by the treasure feels abrupt. A more gradual build-up to her fascination could enhance the moment.
  • The introduction of the bejeweled treasure is visually striking, but the description could be more vivid to evoke a stronger sense of wonder and allure. This would help the audience visualize the treasure's significance and beauty.
  • The scene ends on a somewhat somber note with Morticia's revelation about Gomez's health. While this adds depth, it may disrupt the comedic tone established earlier. A smoother transition or a more humorous line could help maintain the overall tone.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two of dialogue from Tully as he spies on Gomez to provide insight into his motivations and feelings, which would deepen his character and create a stronger connection to the vault scene.
  • Enhance the visual description of the bejeweled treasure to make it more captivating. Use sensory details to evoke its beauty and the emotions it stirs in Margaret.
  • Introduce a moment where Margaret's greed is tested further before she gets stuck in the finger trap, perhaps by having her contemplate the implications of owning such a valuable item.
  • To maintain the comedic tone, consider adding a humorous reaction from Morticia or Granny after Margaret gets stuck in the finger trap, which could lighten the mood before the scene shifts to Gomez's health concerns.
  • Explore the possibility of having Morticia express her worries about Gomez's health in a more humorous or exaggerated manner, which could help balance the darker elements with the family's characteristic humor.



Scene 10 -  Doubloons and Discontent
C20 INT. DEN - SAME TIME C20

At the bookshelf, Tully reaches for a book, approximately
in the same place where Gomez unlocked the secret panel --
but Tully's book comes out of its place on the shelf and
nothing happens.

Biting back his frustration, Tully reads the title, "GONE
WITH THE WIND." He opens the cover. A HURRICANE BLAST OF
WIND GUSTS from the open book, blowing Tully's hair
straight up, rippling his facial muscles. He manages to
close the book and, heart pounding, returns it to the
shelf. He grins sheepishly at

LURCH

Who's been watching him from where he dusts in the hall, a
feather duster in his gigantic hands.

CUT TO:

20 INT. GOMEZ'S STUDY - LATER 20

C.U. TULLY'S BRIEFCASE

Now filled with greenish DOUBLOONS.

Gomez, wearing a green accountant's eyeshade, weighs a
final handful of coins on an old-fashioned measuring scale,
then tosses them into Tully's briefcase.

GOMEZ
There - the monthly expenses.

Tully snaps the briefcase shut and hoists it from Gomez's
desk. It's dead weight in his hand -- another hateful
ordeal.

TULLY
(trying to
phrase it)
I don't suppose you have any paper
money in that vault. Gomez, it's
time. For the new fund. A
checkbook.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 18.

20 CONTINUED: 20

GOMEZ
Never! The banks - I don't trust
them.
(confidentially)
Strange people, Tully.

TULLY
Really?

GOMEZ
(his arm around
Tully)
Not like you and me. Or Fester.
The seance - I need you here.
For him.

TULLY
Seance?

Tully lugs the briefcase toward the door.

GOMEZ
Eight o'clock. By the way ...

Tully turns back.

Gomez flips an extra DOUBLOON across the room. It lands
expertly in Tully's vest pocket.

GOMEZ
I broke another of Judge Womack's
windows this morning.

Tully resumes his put-upon march to the door.

CUT TO:

21 OMITTED 21

22 OMITTED 22
thru thru
26 26

A27 OMITTED A27

B27 EXT. JUDGE WOMACK'S HOUSE - A LITTLE LATER B27

Tully is on the front steps, (Judge Womack won't let him
inside), searching his pockets for the doubloon, help-
lessly enduring another of the Judge's tongue lashings.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 19.

B27 CONTINUED: B27

JUDGE WOMACK
(to Tully)
Still working for Addams...
(to Margaret)
Mother warned you, Margaret. I can
still hear her voice, clear as a
bell, she'd always say, day in and
day out, "Marry Tully Alford..."

TULLY
"... And you'll hear Satan laugh."
Here's your doubloon.

MARGARET
(still wearing the
fingertrap)
I'm stuck!

JUDGE WOMACK
(to Tully)
You lowlife.
(to Margaret)
Are those emeralds?

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family's den, Tully's search for a secret book leads to a surprising gust of wind, amusingly observed by Lurch. Later, in Gomez's study, Tully receives a briefcase of doubloons as Gomez insists on unconventional finances while preparing for a seance. Frustrated by the absence of paper money, Tully reluctantly complies with Gomez's whims. The scene concludes with Tully, now burdened by the doubloons, heading to Judge Womack's house, where he faces further disdain.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Fantasy elements
  • Character interactions
Weaknesses
  • Lack of intense conflict
  • Low emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, engaging, and entertaining. It effectively combines humor, fantasy, and character interactions to create an enjoyable and memorable moment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of magical books and doubloons adds a unique and imaginative element to the scene, enhancing the fantasy and comedic aspects of the story.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses through character interactions, introducing new elements like the doubloons and setting up future events like the seance. It keeps the audience entertained and curious about what will happen next.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique blend of magical realism and humor, with unexpected events and quirky character interactions that set it apart from conventional storytelling.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, each with their own quirks and personalities that shine through in their interactions. Their dialogue and actions contribute to the humor and whimsical tone of the scene.

Character Changes: 5

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the interactions and dialogue help to further establish the personalities and dynamics of the characters.

Internal Goal: 8

Tully's internal goal is to navigate the magical events happening around him and maintain his composure despite the unexpected occurrences. This reflects his need to adapt to challenging situations and his desire to uncover the secrets of the Addams Family.

External Goal: 7.5

Tully's external goal is to retrieve the monthly expenses from Gomez's study and inquire about setting up a new fund with paper money. This reflects his immediate need to fulfill his duties as a financial advisor and address the financial needs of the Addams Family.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is more lighthearted and comedic, focusing on misunderstandings and humorous interactions rather than intense drama.

Opposition: 7.5

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts arising from Tully's financial goals and Gomez's traditional beliefs, creating tension and uncertainty about the outcome.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on comedic and whimsical elements rather than intense conflict or high drama.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new elements like the doubloons, setting up future events like the seance, and deepening the relationships between characters.

Unpredictability: 8.5

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected magical events and quirky character interactions that keep the audience guessing about the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around trust and tradition, with Gomez's distrust of banks contrasting with Tully's more modern approach to financial management. This challenges Tully's beliefs about financial security and the importance of adapting to new methods.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits amusement and entertainment from the audience, with moments of humor and whimsy creating a positive emotional response.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, adding depth to the characters and enhancing the comedic tone of the scene. It keeps the audience entertained and engaged.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of mystery, humor, and magical elements that captivate the audience and keep them invested in the unfolding events.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of dialogue, action, and description that maintains a steady rhythm and keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to the expected formatting standards for its genre, with clear scene headings and descriptions that enhance readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character interactions and progression of events, maintaining the expected format for its genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively uses humor and absurdity, which is a hallmark of the Addams Family franchise. Tully's interaction with the book 'Gone With The Wind' is a clever way to introduce a comedic element while also hinting at the supernatural aspects of the Addams household.
  • The transition between Tully's encounter with Lurch and the subsequent scene in Gomez's study is smooth, maintaining the comedic tone. However, the scene could benefit from a stronger emotional arc for Tully, as he seems to be a passive character reacting to the bizarre events around him rather than actively pursuing his goals.
  • Gomez's character shines through his playful banter and confidence, but Tully's desperation for paper money feels somewhat one-dimensional. The dialogue could be enriched to reflect Tully's internal conflict about his financial situation and his relationship with Gomez.
  • The use of visual gags, such as Tully's hair being blown up by the book, is effective, but the scene could incorporate more physical comedy or visual humor to enhance the absurdity of the situation. For example, Tully could have a more exaggerated reaction to the wind blast, or Lurch could have a more pronounced reaction to Tully's antics.
  • The dialogue between Gomez and Tully is witty, but it lacks a sense of urgency or stakes. Tully's insistence on needing a checkbook could be framed in a way that highlights the consequences of their financial situation, adding tension to the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider giving Tully a more defined goal or motivation in this scene, such as a specific financial need that drives his desperation. This could create a stronger emotional connection for the audience.
  • Enhance Tully's physical comedy during the wind blast scene. Perhaps he could struggle to keep the book closed, leading to a series of humorous mishaps that showcase his clumsiness.
  • Add a moment of reflection for Tully after the wind blast, where he contemplates the absurdity of his situation. This could provide depth to his character and make his frustrations more relatable.
  • Incorporate more visual humor throughout the scene, such as Tully's exaggerated reactions to the bizarre elements of the Addams household or Lurch's deadpan responses to Tully's antics.
  • Strengthen the dialogue by adding more layers to Tully's character. For example, he could express his frustration not just about the money but also about his relationship with Margaret, adding complexity to his interactions with Gomez.



Scene 11 -  A Shocking Revelation
C27 INT. TULLY'S LAW OFFICE - LATER C27

Tully enters the secretary's alcove, still lugging his
impossibly heavy briefcase. His offices were once quite
elegant, but now the leather on the chairs is starting to
crack and a repainting is long overdue.

Tully looks around for his secretary.

TULLY
Miss Bradbury ...
(annoyed)
Miss Bradbury!

ABIGAIL (O.S.)
She's at lunch, Mr. Alford.

Alarmed, Tully steps into

D27 INT. TULLY'S OFFICE - SAME TIME D27

Sitting in a chair on the client's side of Tully's desk is
ABIGAIL CRAVEN, an arrogant, aristocratic-seeming 60ish
doyenne. Her steely will and conniving manipulativeness
are barely veiled by a thin layer of polish and good
manners.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 20.

D27 CONTINUED: D27

Instantly obsequious, Tully sets his heavy briefcase on his
desk and shakes her hand.

TULLY
Mrs. Craven, I was just about to
call you.

ABIGAIL
I'm certain you were.
(she gestures)
You haven't met my son, Gordon, have
have you, Mr. Alford?

Tully turns amiably, but his face falls at the sight of:

GORDON CRAVEN -

Fleshy and round, in his 40's, impeccably if eccentrically
dressed, his dark hair plastered with pomade. With his
barrel chest and his kamikaze demeanor, he is IMMEDIATELY
THREATENING.

Tully blanches.

GORDON
Is this the one, Mother? The
deadbeat you mentioned?

Before Tully can react, Gordon has him by the throat,
hanging him upside down from the wall like an oil painting.

TULLY
(choking)
Wait a minute, hold on! You have
to listen to me!

ABIGAIL
We do, Mr. Alford? And why?

TULLY
Please... Just hear me out...

GORDON
Mother... your call.

ABIGAIL
(to Tully)
Gordon and I enjoy a very... special
relationship. I'm wild about him.

GORDON
(infatuated)
She's a pip.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 21.& 21A.

D27 CONTINUED: (2): D27

ABIGAIL
Refreshing, no?
(after a beat)
Down, Gordon.

GORDON
Mother...

ABIGAIL
(sternly)
Gordon.

TULLY
Gordon!

Gordon lets go, dropping him on his head. Whimpering, Tully
crawls toward his desk.

ABIGAIL
And how is your wife, Mr. Alford? I've
heard so much about her. Still
charming? Still spending?

TULLY
I don't have the money to repay you...
I've tried everything...

ABIGAIL
We've lent you a considerable sum. Many
thousands of dollars. Payment due.

TULLY
Soon, I promise.

ABIGAIL
Oh, Gordon - I want to believe him...

GORDON
So do I...

ABIGAIL
(re: Gordon)
He's so terribly trusting.

GORDON
She's a saint.

ABIGAIL
(to Gordon)
Silly boy... make me proud.

Gordon grabs Tully and sweeps him onto his desk.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 22.

D27 CONTINUED: (3): D27

TULLY'S BRIEFCASE

pops open as it hits the floor. The Addams' doubloons
SPILL OUT.

Abigail and Gordon light up at the sight of the gold. They
share a malicious smile. Gordon leers down at the battered
Tully.
GORDON
He lied to us, Mother.

TULLY
(babbling hysterically)
It's not what you think! Those are
doubloons! For the Addams account!

ABIGAIL
Addams?

TULLY
There's more, there's a fortune, but
no one can get to it! Don't you think
I've tried?

ABIGAIL
Have you? Have you tried hard
enough? Ask him, Sweetheart.

Gordon descends on Tully, menacingly.

TULLY
No! Sweetheart! Don't ask!

TULLY'S CRINGING POV

Gordon's face hovers inches from his own. The glare from
the lightbulb hanging overhead whites out Gordon's hair --
making Gordon look as bald as a cue-ball.

It's like a sudden vision. The inspiration is obviously
born of terror. Gordon is the SPITTING IMAGE OF THE
LONG-LOST FESTER, as he would appear twenty-five years
later.

TULLY,

disbelieving, comes nose-to-nose with Gordon.

TULLY
(in a shocked,
croaky whisper)
Fester...?

Gordon makes a face at his mother.
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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 23.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In Tully's disheveled law office, he faces the manipulative Abigail Craven and her menacing son, Gordon. Overpowered by Gordon's aggression, Tully desperately tries to explain his financial troubles, but the situation escalates when his briefcase spills open, revealing gold doubloons. This unexpected twist captures Abigail and Gordon's attention, leading Tully to reveal that the doubloons are tied to the Addams account. In a moment of realization, Tully notices Gordon's resemblance to the long-lost Fester, leaving him in shock as he whispers the name 'Fester.'
Strengths
  • Tense atmosphere
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Intriguing plot developments
  • Sharp dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some may find the scene too dark or menacing

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, engaging, and effectively builds tension through the interactions between the characters. The introduction of the doubloons adds an element of suspense and sets up future plot developments.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a confrontation between Tully and the Cravens, along with the introduction of the doubloons, is intriguing and sets up future conflicts and plot developments.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly in this scene through the introduction of the doubloons and the escalating tension between the characters. It sets up future conflicts and adds depth to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its unique character dynamics, unexpected plot twists, and darkly comedic tone. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Tully, Abigail, and Gordon are well-developed and their interactions are engaging. Each character's personality shines through in their dialogue and actions.

Character Changes: 7

Tully undergoes a significant change in this scene, facing the intimidating Cravens and the revelation of the doubloons. This experience will likely impact his future decisions and actions.

Internal Goal: 8

Tully's internal goal is to navigate a difficult situation with his clients while maintaining his composure and reputation. This reflects his need for financial stability and professional success.

External Goal: 7

Tully's external goal is to convince his clients to give him more time to repay a considerable sum of money. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in terms of financial debt and reputation.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in this scene is high, with tension escalating between the characters and the introduction of the doubloons adding a new layer of intrigue and suspense.

Opposition: 9

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing difficult challenges and obstacles that create uncertainty and suspense for the audience.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, with Tully facing the threat of the Cravens and the pressure to repay the considerable sum of money. The introduction of the doubloons adds a new layer of complexity to the situation.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by introducing the doubloons, escalating the conflict between the characters, and setting up future plot developments.

Unpredictability: 9

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and dialogue of the characters, as well as the sudden plot twists that challenge the audience's expectations.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around trust, power, and manipulation. Abigail and Gordon manipulate Tully, challenging his beliefs about honesty and integrity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension and anxiety to dark humor and manipulation. The interactions between the characters create a palpable sense of unease.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, witty, and effectively conveys the tension and manipulation between the characters. Each line adds depth to the scene and reveals more about the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense conflict, sharp dialogue, and unexpected plot twists that keep the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a rhythmic flow that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, following the expected format for a screenplay in its genre.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a dramatic confrontation, building tension and suspense effectively.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes Tully's precarious situation, showcasing his desperation and the threat posed by Abigail and Gordon. However, the transition from Tully's office to the confrontation feels abrupt. A smoother transition could enhance the flow of the narrative.
  • The characterization of Abigail and Gordon is strong, with their manipulative and threatening nature clearly conveyed. However, Gordon's introduction could benefit from a more gradual build-up to emphasize Tully's fear and the power dynamic at play.
  • The dialogue is sharp and captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams family. However, Tully's frantic explanations could be more concise to maintain tension and urgency. Streamlining his dialogue would enhance the pacing of the scene.
  • The visual imagery of Tully being hung upside down and the briefcase spilling open adds a comedic element, but the scene could benefit from more physical comedy or visual gags to align with the overall tone of the Addams family narrative.
  • The revelation of Gordon resembling Fester is a strong twist, but it could be foreshadowed earlier in the scene to create a more satisfying payoff. Subtle hints or visual cues could build anticipation for this moment.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of Tully's internal thoughts or fears before he enters the office to set the tone and build tension.
  • Introduce Gordon with a more gradual reveal, perhaps by having Tully notice something off about him before the confrontation escalates.
  • Streamline Tully's dialogue to focus on key phrases that convey his desperation without losing the comedic tone.
  • Incorporate more physical comedy, such as Tully's exaggerated reactions or clumsy attempts to escape, to enhance the humor of the scene.
  • Foreshadow Gordon's resemblance to Fester earlier in the scene, perhaps through Tully's nervous glances or comments about family resemblance, to create a stronger connection to the overall plot.



Scene 12 -  Stormy Schemes
E27 EXT. THE ADDAMS MANSION - SILHOUETTED AGAINST THE E27
NIGHT SKY

RAIN, THUNDER AND LIGHTNING!
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27 INT. ADDAMS MANSION DEN - EVENING 27

Morticia stands at the open window. Gomez stands behind
her, his arms around her waist.

GOMEZ
(passionately)
Hailstones...

MORTICIA
And lightning...

GOMEZ
(nuzzling her)
It's a miserable night.

MORTICIA
(aroused)
I know, darling. Seance weather.

Morticia leans out the window.

MORTICIA
(festively)
Children, we're starting!
(amused)
Put down that antenna!

Another LIGHTNING FLASH.
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28 OMITTED 28

29 OMITTED 29

A30 INT. MOTEL ROOM - SAME TIME A30

A typical, rundown, highway-style motel room, with stained
fiberglass curtains and a splotchy oil painting. Gordon
is seated on the bed, facing a cracked mirror. Abigail
stands behind him, consulting a picture of FESTER that
Tully has lent them.
ABIGAIL
(staring at the
picture)
It's uncanny. My little boy, and
this hideous creature.

GORDON
(hurt)
Mother...
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/14/90 24.

A30 CONTINUED: A30

ABIGAIL
(correcting herself)
Handsome creation.
(putting a towel on
Gordon's shoulders)
Think of it, my angel - no more
grubby store-front scams. No more
loansharking to scum like Tully
Alford. All that delicious money
- I can feel it, right in my
fingertips.

GORDON
So can I...

ABIGAIL
(in his ear)
Just one week and out. You locate
the vault and then we're gone -
poof! Before they notice what's
missing.

GORDON
And Alford?

ABIGAIL
We need him - for now. And later,
we'll be miles away, and he'll
take the rap.

GORDON
(intensely)
You're so good.

Abigail holds up a shaving brush, covered with foam.

ABIGAIL
(seductively)
Shave and a haircut, Mister?

GORDON
(breathing heavily)
Two bits.

Gordon moans orgasmically as Abigail begins to shave him.

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30 OMITTED 30
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary On a stormy night, Morticia and Gomez share a romantic moment in the Addams Mansion, discussing the weather's suitability for a séance while playfully calling for their children. Meanwhile, in a rundown motel room, Gordon grapples with his mother's manipulative plans involving a character named Fester and their scheme to exploit Tully Alford for wealth. As Abigail encourages Gordon's involvement, the scene ends with a suggestive moment as she prepares to shave him, highlighting the tension between their ambitions and his hesitations.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Some scenes may be overly complex for casual viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, passion, and intrigue, setting up future plot developments while maintaining a light-hearted tone.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a family seance in a darkly comedic setting is unique and engaging, providing opportunities for humor, drama, and character development.

Plot: 7

The plot advances through character interactions, setting up future conflicts and revealing hidden agendas, adding depth to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a gothic setting with humorous dialogue and unique character interactions.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, each with their own quirks and motivations, driving the scene forward with their actions and dialogue.

Character Changes: 7

Some characters undergo subtle changes in their motivations and relationships, setting up future developments in the story.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal in this scene is to engage in a seance, which reflects her deeper desire for the supernatural and the macabre.

External Goal: 7

The external goal is for Gordon and Abigail to locate a vault and steal money, reflecting their immediate circumstances and challenges.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, with characters engaging in verbal sparring, secret schemes, and hidden agendas.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals and motivations between characters that create tension.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high, with characters engaging in secretive schemes, hidden agendas, and potential conflicts that could impact their relationships.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, revealing hidden agendas, and setting up future plot developments.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in character motivations and actions.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between Gordon and Abigail's criminal actions and their moral values, as they plan to deceive and steal from others.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a range of emotions, from passion and humor to concern and intrigue, engaging the audience on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and revealing, showcasing the relationships between characters and setting up future conflicts.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of humor, suspense, and character dynamics that keep the audience intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing suspenseful moments with comedic dialogue.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting follows the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a gothic comedy genre, with a clear setup and character interactions.


Critique
  • The scene effectively contrasts the Addams family's dark humor with the more sinister intentions of Abigail and Gordon, creating a compelling juxtaposition. However, the transition between the two settings could be smoother to maintain the flow of the narrative.
  • The dialogue between Morticia and Gomez is playful and flirtatious, which fits their characters well. However, the line 'Put down that antenna!' feels slightly out of place and could be rephrased to better match the tone of the scene. It disrupts the romantic atmosphere they have established.
  • Abigail's dialogue is manipulative and reveals her character's motivations clearly, but it could benefit from more subtlety. The line 'All that delicious money - I can feel it, right in my fingertips' is a bit on-the-nose and could be reworked to show her greed without explicitly stating it.
  • Gordon's character is introduced as somewhat passive and easily influenced by his mother. Adding a moment where he asserts himself or shows a hint of reluctance could add depth to his character and make the audience more invested in his arc.
  • The scene ends on a suggestive note with the shaving moment, which is humorous but may come off as overly sexualized for the context. Balancing the humor with the suggestiveness could enhance the comedic effect without crossing into discomfort.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of tension or conflict in the Addams mansion scene, perhaps with a humorous interruption from the children, to enhance the comedic timing before cutting to the motel room.
  • Rephrase Morticia's admonition about the antenna to something that feels more in line with her character, perhaps something more whimsical or darkly humorous.
  • Make Abigail's greed more implicit by showing her actions or expressions rather than stating it outright. For example, she could be fidgeting with jewelry or looking around the room as if imagining the wealth.
  • Give Gordon a moment of hesitation or doubt about the plan to steal from the Addams family, which could create a more complex dynamic between him and Abigail.
  • Consider toning down the suggestiveness of the shaving scene or adding a comedic twist to it, such as an unexpected interruption that highlights the absurdity of the situation.



Scene 13 -  A Rainy Welcome
31 INT. ENTRYWAY - A FEW MINUTES LATER 31

Lurch peels off Margaret's and Tully's wet overcoats.
Margaret wears the same clothes she wore on her earlier
visit -- the finger trap has made it impossible for her
to change.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 25.

31 CONTINUED: 31

MARGARET
What a miserable evening.

TULLY
Don't add to it.

Wednesday has come to escort them. Tully tries to make
conversation.

TULLY
Big night for you guys! Hey,
small fry.

Tully reaches out to pat Wednesday's head. She moves away.

MARGARET
Hello, sweetheart.
(holding up her
trapped hands)
Could you?

Wednesday deftly releases the trap from Margaret's fingers.
Margaret is amazed. She tries to straighten her disheveled
clothes.

MARGARET
Thank God. Call me a cab, Tully...

TULLY
Get it yourself...

MARGARET
Give me the car keys...

TULLY
Give it a rest...

Morticia appears.

MORTICIA
Welcome, honored guests.

Lurch presents a tray of vile-looking canapes. Morticia
motions to the tray.

MORTICIA
Entrails?

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 25A.

A32 LURCH AT HIS ORGAN A32

He plays a CRASHING CHORD.

MORTICIA (O.S.)
Let us gather, in this house of
yearning, on this day of heartsick
loss, at this table of woe. Is
everyone comfortable?

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 26.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the entryway of the Addams family home, Margaret expresses her frustration about a miserable evening while Tully dismisses her complaints. Wednesday arrives to help and skillfully frees Margaret from a finger trap. Despite her requests for a cab and car keys, Tully refuses to assist. Morticia enters, warmly welcoming the guests and offering them grotesque canapes, maintaining the family's eerie charm. The scene blends dark comedy with the absurdity of the situation, ending with Morticia asking if everyone is comfortable.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Dark humor
  • Quirky atmosphere
Weaknesses
  • Low emotional impact
  • Lack of significant character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the unique tone and humor of the Addams Family, with strong character interactions and comedic moments that keep the audience engaged.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on the eccentric Addams Family and their interactions with outsiders, is well-executed and stays true to the established tone of the franchise.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the arrival of outsiders at the Addams Mansion, leading to comedic interactions and conflicts. While the plot is entertaining, it serves more as a setup for character dynamics and humor.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of the Addams Family's eccentric lifestyle and the clash with Margaret's more conventional worldview. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their unique personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene, especially the Addams Family members, are well-developed, quirky, and entertaining. Their interactions drive the humor and dynamics of the scene.

Character Changes: 4

While there are no significant character changes in the scene, the interactions and conflicts help highlight the unique traits of each character.

Internal Goal: 8

Margaret's internal goal in this scene is to maintain her composure and dignity despite the embarrassing situation she finds herself in. This reflects her desire to appear sophisticated and in control, even when faced with challenges.

External Goal: 7

Margaret's external goal is to leave the Addams Family mansion as quickly as possible and get away from the uncomfortable situation. This reflects the immediate challenge she is facing in trying to escape the awkwardness of the situation.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is more comedic and situational, focusing on misunderstandings and eccentric interactions rather than high-stakes drama.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Margaret is faced with the challenge of interacting with the Addams Family and maintaining her composure in a difficult situation. The audience is unsure of how she will navigate the conflict.

High Stakes: 3

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on comedic misunderstandings and eccentric interactions rather than high-stakes drama.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new characters, setting up conflicts, and establishing the tone and dynamics of the Addams Family.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected interactions between the characters and the dark humor that keeps the audience guessing about what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between the Addams Family's dark and morbid worldview and Margaret's more conventional and uptight perspective. This challenges Margaret's beliefs and values, as she is forced to interact with a family that is completely different from her own.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 5

The scene prioritizes humor and quirkiness over emotional depth, resulting in a lower emotional impact on the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, reflecting the unique personalities of the characters and adding to the overall dark comedy tone.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the dynamic interactions between the characters, the dark humor, and the tension created by the clash of worldviews. The dialogue is sharp and witty, keeping the audience interested in the unfolding drama.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and maintaining the audience's interest. The rhythm of the dialogue and the interactions between the characters contribute to the overall effectiveness of the scene.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene follows the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the atmosphere of the scene.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a dark comedy genre, with a focus on character interactions and witty dialogue. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively maintains the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the interactions between Tully, Margaret, and Wednesday. However, the dialogue could be sharpened to enhance the comedic timing and wit, which is a hallmark of the franchise.
  • Margaret's predicament with the finger trap is a clever visual gag, but it could be emphasized more in the dialogue to heighten the absurdity of her situation. For instance, she could express more frustration or make a humorous remark about her inability to change clothes, which would add depth to her character.
  • Tully's dismissive attitude towards Margaret's requests feels a bit flat. Adding a layer of sarcasm or a humorous retort could make his character more engaging and highlight the dysfunctional nature of their relationship.
  • Wednesday's character shines in this scene, showcasing her competence and independence. However, her dialogue could be more sardonic or deadpan to align with her established persona, making her interactions with Tully and Margaret more impactful.
  • Morticia's entrance is strong, but her line about the canapes could be more grotesque or witty to match the tone of the Addams Family. This would reinforce the family's eccentricity and add to the comedic effect of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Revise Margaret's dialogue to include more humor about her situation with the finger trap, perhaps by having her make a sarcastic comment about being stuck in the same clothes.
  • Enhance Tully's character by giving him a more humorous or sarcastic response to Margaret's requests, which would add depth to his character and highlight the tension in their relationship.
  • Consider adding a line for Wednesday that showcases her dark humor, perhaps a quip about the finger trap or Tully's ineptitude, to strengthen her character's presence in the scene.
  • Make Morticia's line about the canapes more grotesque or witty, perhaps by describing them in a way that reflects the family's macabre sense of humor, to better fit the Addams Family tone.
  • Explore the possibility of adding a brief moment of physical comedy, such as Lurch struggling with the canapes or Margaret's attempts to fix her clothes, to enhance the visual humor of the scene.



Scene 14 -  A Chaotic Séance
32 INT. DEN - SAME TIME 32

The family and Tully and Margaret sit at a round table,
the crystal ball in the center. In the background, Lurch
continues to play mood music on the organ. Morticia
holds a tarnished gold CANDLEHOLDER in the shape of a
RAVEN. The candle is in its belly and the beams of light
glow from its eyes.

MORTICIA
Sing, O spirits! Harken, all souls!
Every year on this date, we offer a
clarion call to Fester Addams.

WEDNESDAY
(to Pugsley)
Stop it!

GOMEZ
(scolding, playfully)
Pugsley...

Pugsley has a meat cleaver aimed at his sister.
Reluctantly, he hands it to Gomez.

GOMEZ
(bemused, to Tully)
Kids.

MORTICIA
(raising the raven)
From generations, to generation,
our beacon to the beyond.
(passing the raven
to Wednesday)
Do you accept the glorious burden?

WEDNESDAY
(taking the raven)
May it weigh me down through all
my melancholy years.

MORTICIA
All close eyes and join hands.

They do. Granny takes a squeamish Margaret's hand.

GRANNY
Ow! What a grip!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/14/90 27.

32 CONTINUED: 32

Granny pulls away, leaving her "hand" behind, her sleeve
apparently empty.

GRANNY
My hand! She's got my hand!

Left holding Thing, Margaret shrieks.

Pugsley laughs appreciatively.

Margaret tries to shake Thing off, but he hangs on
tightly. Granny cackles.

MARGARET
Excuse me...

Ashen, Margaret tries to escape. Tully pulls her back
to her seat.

TULLY
Sit down, Pumpkin. Join the fun.

MORTICIA
(affectionately)
Mama, you should know better.
Thing - you're a handful.

Thing lets go and runs off.


Margaret sits, stiff as a corpse. Still chuckling,
Granny takes a hold of Margaret's now-rigid hand with her
own real hand. Margaret shudders.

With a last look around the table to insure that everyone
has settled down, Morticia resumes the seance.

MORTICIA
Wednesday...

WEDNESDAY
(intones)
"Let us ransom you
from the power of the grave.
Tonight, O Death,
Let us be your plague."

MORTICIA
Mama...

GRANNY
I feel that he's near... Fester
Addams, gather your strength and
knock three times.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/14/90 28.

33 OMITTED 33
and and
34 34
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Horror"]

Summary The Addams family gathers for a séance to summon Fester Addams, led by Morticia with a raven-shaped candlestick. Amidst sibling antics from Wednesday and Pugsley, Granny humorously loses her hand to Thing, causing panic for the uncomfortable Margaret. Despite the chaos, Morticia strives to maintain the ritual, blending dark humor with eerie elements as the family navigates their quirky traditions.
Strengths
  • Unique concept
  • Strong character interactions
  • Witty dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of intense conflict
  • Limited character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, mystery, and supernatural elements to create an engaging and entertaining atmosphere.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a family seance to contact a deceased relative fits well within the overall theme of the Addams Family's macabre and eccentric lifestyle.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the seance and the interactions between the characters, adding depth to their relationships and personalities.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to supernatural themes, with authentic character actions and dialogue that stay true to the Addams Family's eccentric nature.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric and quirky personalities, adding humor and depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 6

There are subtle character interactions and developments, but no significant changes occur during the scene.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to maintain the family's traditions and connection with their deceased relative, Fester Addams. This reflects their deeper need for belonging, identity, and a sense of continuity with their heritage.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully conduct the seance and communicate with Fester Addams. This reflects the immediate challenge of honoring their family's traditions and maintaining their supernatural connection.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some conflict between the characters, the scene focuses more on humor and supernatural elements rather than intense conflict.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with minor obstacles and conflicts that add tension and humor to the seance ritual.

High Stakes: 5

While there is some tension and mystery in the scene, the stakes are not extremely high, focusing more on humor and eccentricity.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by showcasing the Addams Family's traditions and relationships, setting the stage for future events.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected interactions and supernatural occurrences, adding an element of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the belief in the afterlife and the supernatural. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs in the existence of spirits and the ability to communicate with the deceased.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including humor, eeriness, and sarcasm, but the emotional impact is not the primary focus.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, reflecting the unique personalities of the characters and adding to the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of humor, supernatural elements, and quirky family dynamics, keeping the audience entertained and intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay in its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a supernatural family comedy, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor and eccentricity of the Addams family, particularly through the interactions during the séance. However, the pacing feels uneven, especially with the transition from the playful banter to the more serious tone of the séance. This could be smoothed out to maintain a consistent rhythm throughout.
  • The dialogue is witty and fits the characters well, but some lines could be tightened for clarity and impact. For instance, Morticia's invocation could be more concise to enhance the dramatic effect of the séance.
  • The visual elements, such as the raven-shaped candlestick and the mood music from Lurch, are strong and contribute to the atmosphere. However, the scene could benefit from more specific descriptions of the characters' expressions and body language to enhance the comedic and eerie tone.
  • Margaret's reaction to Thing is humorous, but her character could be developed further to show her personality beyond just being frightened. This would create a more engaging dynamic between her and the Addams family.
  • The scene ends abruptly after Granny's line about Fester knocking three times. This could be an opportunity to build suspense or humor by showing the family's reactions or adding a moment of anticipation before cutting to the next scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising Morticia's invocation to be more succinct, allowing for a stronger emotional impact as the séance begins.
  • Add more physical comedy or visual gags involving the characters' reactions to the séance, particularly from Tully and Margaret, to enhance the humor.
  • Develop Margaret's character further by giving her a witty retort or a moment of bravery that contrasts with her initial fear, making her a more active participant in the scene.
  • Include a brief moment of tension or anticipation after Granny's line about Fester knocking three times, perhaps with a comedic twist that highlights the family's quirks.
  • Ensure that the transitions between the playful and serious tones are smoother, possibly by incorporating more dialogue that bridges the two moods.



Scene 15 -  The Return of Fester
35 EXT. THE FRONT DOOR - SAME TIME 35

We see Gordon's hand on the DOOR KNOCKER - just his hand.
He pounds THREE TIMES, the heavy hollow sound
reverberating...

CUT TO:

36 INT. DEN - SAME TIME 36

Granny's eyes pop open.

GRANNY
Did you hear that?!

MORTICIA
Ask again, Mama. Quickly.

Lurch's organ music perfectly underscores and punctuates
the scene.


TULLY
By all means!

Tully smirks, barely able to contain his smug enthusiasm.

GOMEZ
(urgently)
Ask! Ask!

GRANNY
Fester Addams - I demand that you
knock again!

CUT TO:

37 EXT. THE FRONT DOOR - SAME TIME 37

Waiting for someone to answer, Gordon's hand again KNOCKS
THREE TIMES, this time even harder.

CUT TO:

38 INT. DEN - SAME TIME 38

The knocking reverberates through the room. Jubilant,
Gomez springs to his feet. Lurch hits a crescendo on
the organ.

GOMEZ
He's at the door!

He runs out and through the house to the
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 29.

39 INT./EXT. ENTRYWAY/FRONT STOOP - SAME TIME 39

His family at his heels, Gomez eagerly pulls open the
front door.

There on the front steps stands GORDON -- FESTER FROM
BEYOND. Gordon's head is completely shaved, and his
clothing and pallor are pure Fester. The exact
resemblance is shocking. It seems a miracle.

Gomez and Fester stare at each other. Fester's eyes
have a hard, I-dare-you-to-question-me look in them.
Neither man says a word.

MORTICIA
Could it be?

GRANNY
Is that him?

TULLY
(innocently)
Is it possible?

MARGARET
Oh my God...

Morticia looks to Gomez for confirmation. Gomez and
Fester continue their face-off.

Gomez breaks the stalemate.

GOMEZ
Fester!

FESTER
Gomez!

Gomez throws open his arms. He smothers Fester in an
embrace. Fester endures it. Abigail steps forward; she
now wears a plain, dowdy suit, and her hair is in braided
coils. She now speaks in a German/Austrian accent.

ABIGAIL
Gut evenink. I am Dr. Pinder-Schloss.
Genres: ["Comedy","Horror","Fantasy"]

Summary Gordon knocks on the Addams family door, prompting Granny to urge him to knock again. The family, including Morticia, Gomez, and Tully, eagerly awaits Fester's arrival. When Gordon knocks a second time, Gomez excitedly opens the door to find Gordon transformed into Fester, leading to a joyful reunion. Abigail, now in a new persona, adds to the scene's intrigue as the family celebrates Fester's return.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Mysterious and suspenseful atmosphere
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be too over-the-top for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, with a perfect blend of humor, mystery, and suspense. The dramatic return of Fester adds depth to the storyline and keeps the audience intrigued.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of Fester's return and the mysterious circumstances surrounding it are intriguing and add depth to the overall storyline. It introduces new conflicts and dynamics within the Addams Family.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and moves the story forward significantly with the return of Fester. It introduces new conflicts and sets the stage for further developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the theme of family dynamics and identity through the lens of the Addams Family's unconventional lifestyle. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions are engaging, especially with the introduction of Fester and the dynamics between the family members and Tully. Each character's personality shines through in their dialogue and actions.

Character Changes: 8

The return of Fester brings about significant changes in the dynamics and relationships within the Addams Family, especially with Gomez and Morticia. It sets the stage for character growth and development.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to confirm the identity of the newcomer, Fester, and to reconnect with his long-lost brother. This reflects Gomez's deeper desire for family unity and acceptance.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to welcome Fester back into the family and ensure his safety and well-being. This reflects the immediate challenge of accepting Fester's return and integrating him back into the family dynamic.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is high, with the tension surrounding Fester's return and the interactions between the characters. It keeps the audience engaged and eager to see how the conflicts will unfold.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters questioning Fester's identity and the uncertainty of his return adding tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene, especially with the mysterious return of Fester and the potential impact on the Addams Family. It adds tension and suspense to the storyline.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly with the return of Fester and the introduction of new conflicts and dynamics. It sets the stage for further developments and keeps the audience engaged.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the mystery surrounding Fester's return and the characters' reactions to his appearance.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the theme of identity and acceptance. The characters question Fester's true identity and struggle with accepting him back into the family, challenging their beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, especially with the reunion of Fester and the reactions of the characters. It evokes curiosity, shock, and excitement in the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and adds depth to the characters and their relationships. It effectively conveys the emotions and intentions of the characters in the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its suspenseful buildup, quirky characters, and unexpected twist with Fester's return.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense leading up to Fester's reveal, then resolving the conflict with his return.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a gothic comedy genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution that advances the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds suspense and anticipation with the repeated knocking and the characters' reactions. However, the pacing could be improved by varying the rhythm of the dialogue and actions to enhance the tension further.
  • The dialogue captures the quirky essence of the Addams Family, but some lines, particularly Tully's, feel a bit forced. His smirk and enthusiasm could be shown through action rather than explicit dialogue, allowing the audience to infer his feelings.
  • The transition between the exterior and interior scenes is well-executed, but the use of 'CUT TO' could be streamlined. Instead of explicitly stating 'CUT TO,' consider using more fluid transitions that maintain the scene's momentum.
  • The character of Gordon is introduced in a visually striking way, but his transformation into Fester could be foreshadowed more subtly earlier in the script. This would enhance the reveal's impact and make it feel less abrupt.
  • The introduction of Abigail as Dr. Pinder-Schloss is intriguing, but her character could benefit from a more distinct personality trait or quirk that sets her apart from the other characters. This would make her more memorable and engaging.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of silence or a pause after the knocking to heighten the suspense before the characters react. This could create a more dramatic buildup.
  • Revise Tully's dialogue to be more implicit. Instead of stating his enthusiasm, show it through his body language or facial expressions, allowing the audience to read his character more naturally.
  • Eliminate the explicit 'CUT TO' transitions and instead use visual cues or sound effects to indicate the shift between the exterior and interior scenes, creating a smoother flow.
  • Introduce subtle hints about Gordon's resemblance to Fester earlier in the script, perhaps through dialogue or visual cues, to make the reveal feel more organic.
  • Give Abigail a unique quirk or catchphrase that reflects her manipulative nature, making her character more distinct and memorable in the context of the Addams Family.



Scene 16 -  Fester's Return: A Family Reunion with Doubts
40 INT. DRAWING ROOM - A SHORT WHILE LATER 40

Fester stands by the tall, baronial fireplace where an
enormous fire burns. Steam rises off his wet greatcoat,
enveloping him. He seems immobile, a pair of shining
black ferret eyes, calculating.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 30.

40 CONTINUED: 40

Pugsley stands nearby, beside Fester's steamer trunk,
studying the exotic decals.

ABIGAIL
How did zis happen? How did it come to
be. Ze story - it is most amazink, and
also beautiful. He vas found in Miami,
tangled in ze tuna net! It vas just
last month, during ze Hurricane Helga.
Ze sky, it vas black like pitch. Ze
vaves, zay vere valls of doom. Can you
imagine? Zen - zey drag him from ze
ocean, from ze very jaws of oblivion.
I'm tellink you! Zere are tests, so
many tests, and a complete
psychological profile. At long last,
ze Florida Department of Fish unt ze
Game, ze say, low unt beholdt, my oh my
go tell it on ze mountaintop - he is...
your bruzzer! Boom! Zey gif him to
me, at Human Services, and I am
bringink him, after all zese years,
after who knows vat heartache, after ze
naked unt ze dead, I am bringink him
home to you!

MARGARET
That's preposterous.

TULLY
Margaret...

Tully nudges her in the ribs to shut up.

MARGARET
But don't you think that's absurd?

TULLY
Honey...

MARGARET
Isn't that the most ridiculous
thing you've ever heard?

TULLY
(through gritted teeth)
Blossom...

GOMEZ
It certainly is.

Gomez slaps Fester companionably. Fester hates being
touched.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 31.

40 CONTINUED: (2) 40

GOMEZ
And now you're back.

TULLY
Back to share your joys, back to
share your sorrows, back to share
- well, hey - everything!

MARGARET
Well, I just don't know...

Tully hands Margaret the fingertrap to distract her.

TULLY
Darling, how does this work again?

MARGARET
An infant would understand...

Margaret, disgusted with Tully, demonstrates the
fingertrap. Her fingers are instantly stuck again.

MORTICIA
Fester Addams - home at long last.

FESTER
Well, at least... for a week.

MORTICIA
A week?

GOMEZ
Don't be ridiculous! You're home!

FESTER
Sorry, but I have to get back.
I've got a lot of things cooking -
in the Bermuda Triangle.

MORTICIA
(aglow with romance)
Oh, Gomez. The Bermuda Triangle.

GOMEZ
(fondly)
Devil's Island...

MORTICIA
(dreamy)
The Black Hole of Calcutta.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 32.

40 CONTINUED: (3) 40

GOMEZ
(to the group)
Excuse us.

MORTICIA
Second honeymoon.

At the steamer trunk, Pugsley is disintegrating the lock
with a beakerful of acid and an eyedropper.

MORTICIA
(to Abigail)
Dr. Pinder-Schloss, will you be
staying too?

ABIGAIL
No, no, I really must be goink.
But I vill be back, you can bet.
To be checkink on Fester's
adjustment.

The acid has eaten away the lock on Fester's trunk.
Pugsley opens the trunk a crack. He fishes among the
contents, his arm inside up to the shoulder. Something
snaps. He grins, then pulls out his hand. His fingers
are crushed in a rusty, ferocious-looking BEAR TRAP.

PUGSLEY
Cool.

Wednesday alone stands apart in her mournful fashion.
She is instinctively SUSPICIOUS of this new Fester.

WEDNESDAY
Nobody gets out of the Bermuda
Triangle. Not even for a vacation.
Everyone knows that.

ABIGAIL
(to Wednesday)
Oh, my little vun. Zere is zo much
you do not understandt. Ze human
spirit - it is - a hard tink to kill.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/29/90 33.

40 CONTINUED: (4) 40

GRANNY
(agreeing)
Even with a chainsaw.

Abigail pinches Wednesday's cheek, hard. Wednesday
continues to stare at Fester.
CUT TO:

41 OMITTED 41
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family's drawing room, Fester makes a dramatic return after being found in Miami during Hurricane Helga, but his limited time due to obligations in the Bermuda Triangle raises skepticism, particularly from Wednesday. While Gomez and Morticia warmly welcome him, Margaret questions the absurdity of the situation, leading to a mix of dark humor and familial warmth. Pugsley's curiosity leads to a mishap with a bear trap, further highlighting the quirky dynamics of the family as Wednesday remains suspicious of Fester's story.
Strengths
  • Engaging plot development
  • Strong character reactions
  • Humorous dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly comedic and detract from the emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces a major plot development with Fester's return, maintains a whimsical and humorous tone, and sets up intrigue for future events.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Fester's return and the family's reaction is engaging and sets the stage for further developments in the story.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with Fester's return, introducing new conflicts and dynamics within the family.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and bizarre situations, such as Fester's mysterious return and the family's reaction to it. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their reactions to Fester's return add depth to their personalities.

Character Changes: 7

Fester's return brings about changes in the dynamics of the family, especially in how they interact with him.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to adjust to the return of Fester, their long-lost brother, and to understand his true intentions. This reflects their need for family connection and security.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to welcome Fester back into the family and ensure his well-being. This reflects the immediate challenge of integrating a new member into their unconventional family dynamic.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict introduced with Fester's return and the family's reactions to it.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the skepticism and suspicion surrounding Fester's return, adding a layer of tension and uncertainty to the family dynamics.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high with Fester's return potentially impacting the family dynamics and future events.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing a major plot development with Fester's return.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in Fester's return and the family's reactions. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the acceptance of Fester's return and the skepticism of his true identity. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in loyalty and trust within the family.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, especially with the anticipation and mystery surrounding Fester's return.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and humorous, adding to the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its witty dialogue, eccentric characters, and mysterious plot developments. The audience is drawn into the quirky world of the Addams Family and their unique dynamics.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, balancing dialogue-heavy moments with action and character interactions. The rhythm enhances the comedic timing and dramatic tension.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear descriptions of characters and settings. The dialogue is formatted correctly, enhancing readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a focus on character interactions and quirky dialogue. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the overall effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor and eccentricity of the Addams Family, particularly through Abigail's exaggerated storytelling about Fester's return. However, the pacing feels uneven; the dialogue is dense and could benefit from more pauses or reactions to allow the humor to land better.
  • Margaret's skepticism is a strong character trait, but her dialogue could be more concise. The back-and-forth with Tully feels repetitive and could be streamlined to maintain the scene's momentum. This would help keep the audience engaged without losing the comedic tone.
  • Fester's character is introduced with a sense of mystery, but his dialogue lacks depth. While he is portrayed as calculating, it would be beneficial to give him a line or two that hints at his personality or past experiences, making him more relatable or intriguing.
  • The interactions between the characters are lively, but the scene could benefit from more physical comedy or visual gags, especially with Pugsley and the bear trap. This would enhance the visual storytelling and align with the Addams Family's quirky nature.
  • Wednesday's suspicion of Fester is a great character moment, but it could be emphasized further. Perhaps she could have a more pointed line that showcases her intelligence and intuition, reinforcing her role as the family's moral compass amidst the chaos.
Suggestions
  • Consider breaking up the dialogue with more physical actions or reactions from the characters to enhance comedic timing and keep the audience engaged.
  • Streamline Margaret's dialogue to make her skepticism more impactful without feeling repetitive. A sharper exchange with Tully could heighten the tension and humor.
  • Add a line or two for Fester that reveals something about his character or his experiences in the Bermuda Triangle, making him more relatable and intriguing.
  • Incorporate more visual gags or physical comedy, especially with Pugsley and the bear trap, to enhance the scene's humor and align with the Addams Family's eccentric style.
  • Strengthen Wednesday's character by giving her a more pointed line that showcases her intelligence and intuition, reinforcing her role as the family's moral compass.



Scene 17 -  Fester's Frightful Night
42 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - LATER 42

Morticia has shown Fester to his room. As she speaks,
the camera lingers on the following photographs atop the
bureau:

A PICTURE OF FESTER AND GOMEZ AS YOUNG BOYS, EACH IN A
DOGGY CARRYING CAGE, BEING HELD BY THEIR FATHER. FATHER
STANDS BESIDE A CRUDE WOODEN SIGN WITH "CAMP CUSTER"
BRANDED INTO IT.

GOMEZ AND FESTER AS BOYS, PROUDLY SITTING ON THE LAP OF A
BOUND-AND-GAGGED SANTA CLAUS.

Morticia begins to open Fester's trunk and go through
it.

MORTICIA
Unpacking - you must be exhausted.
Let me.

FESTER
(alarmed at what she
might find)
No... um... that's all right...
you don't have to...

Morticia begins removing Fester's burglary equipment from
the trunk.

MORTICIA
A crowbar... dynamite... cyanide...
Fester. As if we'd run out.
(she turns to go)
Good night.

She exits. Fester examines two photographs in a hand-
tooled leather frame on the bureau. Imprinted below the
FACE OF THE BEAUTIFUL GIRL ON THE LEFT is the name FLORA,
below the BEAUTIFUL GIRL ON THE RIGHT is FAUNA.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/29/90 33A.

42 CONTINUED: 42

It's clear that they are identical twins.

The CLOCK in the hall STRIKES MIDNIGHT.

It's time to go to work. He opens the door to his room
and peeks out. He sees ...

WEDNESDAY --

in her doorway across the hallway, staring back at him.

He whips back into his room.

FESTER
Nosy little brat...

Frustrated, he looks out again -- Wednesday's door is
shut. He looks both ways.

CUT TO:


A43 INT. ATTIC - A FEW MINUTES LATER A43

The TRAP DOOR RISES in the attic floor. Fester's head
appears.

Fester climbs into the attic. As he does, the camera
PANS around the room, taking in the piles of odd objects
and memorabilia.

Fester approaches a set of GLASS CASES.

ANGLE on the FIRST CASE. The case contains a set of
mounted BUTTERFLIES, pinned in place.

ANGLE on the second, LARGER CASE. In this case there
are several STUFFED VAMPIRE BATS.

ANGLE on the third, STILL LARGER CASE. This case is
about three feet high, and fairly wide. It is empty.

WEDNESDAY (O.S.)
It's reserved.

The camera PULLS BACK. Wednesday stands near the trap
door; staring at Fester, who stands by the empty case.
Fester is startled, but tries to act calm.

FESTER
It's reserved? For what?

WEDNESDAY
For Skipper.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/29/90 33B.

A43 CONTINUED: A43

FESTER
For Skipper? Is he... a dog?

WEDNESDAY
No. Skipper isn't a dog. That
would be cruel.

FESTER
(gruffly)
Of course not. I'm sorry.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/29/90 34.

A43 CONTINUED: (2) A43

WEDNESDAY
He's a bully.

Fester stares at Wednesday. He backs away from her.

CUT TO:


B43 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - A FEW MINUTES LATER B43

Fester runs back into his room and shuts the door.
Wednesday has obviously unnerved him.

He sits on the edge of the bed. A cloud of dust billows
around him. Yawning, he lies down, sinking into the
mattress so deeply that he's almost buried alive.

Getting comfortable, he burrows deeper.

CLOSEUP - FESTER'S EYES. Who knows what terrors they've
seen? But now they lose their coldness, getting dreamy,
then he hears the creak of his door opening...

FESTER
Who's there?

He sees ...

A SHADOW --

thrown huge on the wall. A SINISTER HAND WITH WRIGGLING
FINGERS.

FESTER --

goes for the knife he keeps in his boot, which is next
to the bed, on the floor. The door slams. Veins in his
forehead bulge.

THE WINDOW EXPLODES OPEN --

The wet wind snuffs the candelabra light. There's only
the sound of Fester's animal panting, then LIGHTNING
ILLUMINATES A HAND GRIPPING THE BEDSPREAD.

THERE'S A VAGUE FLICKERING FROM ONE OF THE CANDLES.
Fester seizes it and nurses the flame, using it to re-
light the rest of the candles. As the room fills with
candlelight Fester sees ...

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/13/91 35.

B43 CONTINUED: B43

THING --

sitting on one of his legs.

Fester jumps with fear, pushing against the backboard. He
shakes his leg, violently throwing Thing off. He SCREAMS.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In this suspenseful scene, Morticia shows Fester to his room, where he nervously tries to hide burglary tools from her. As he examines photographs of beautiful twins, he becomes increasingly anxious, especially after encountering the eerie Wednesday, who hints at a dark fate for a bully named Skipper. Fester's unease escalates in the attic, leading to a series of frightening events, including a startling appearance by Thing, culminating in Fester's terrified scream.
Strengths
  • Effective introduction of Fester's character
  • Building suspense and mystery
  • Engaging interactions between characters
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful
  • Limited emotional depth in the scene

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces Fester's character and sets up intrigue and tension through the interaction with Wednesday and the exploration of his belongings. The dark humor and suspenseful elements keep the audience engaged.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of unpacking Fester's belongings to reveal his character traits and history is intriguing and sets up future conflicts and developments. The scene effectively introduces key elements of the story and characters.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses as Fester's character is introduced and his relationship with Wednesday is established. The scene sets up future conflicts and developments related to Fester's past and his interactions with the Addams family.

Originality: 9

The scene demonstrates a high level of originality through its fresh approach to gothic themes, unconventional character dynamics, and darkly comedic tone. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Fester and Wednesday are well-developed in this scene, with their interactions revealing aspects of their personalities and setting up potential conflicts. The scene effectively showcases the unique traits of the Addams family members.

Character Changes: 7

Fester's character undergoes a subtle change as he interacts with Wednesday and begins to reveal more about his past and motivations. This sets up potential character development in future scenes.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal in this scene is to fit in and find acceptance within the Addams family. This reflects his deeper need for belonging and connection, as well as his fear of rejection and isolation.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal in this scene is to navigate the strange and unsettling environment of the Addams mansion without revealing his true intentions. This reflects the immediate challenge of maintaining his cover and avoiding suspicion.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily through the interactions between Fester and Wednesday, as well as the mystery surrounding Fester's past and intentions.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Wednesday challenging Fester's assumptions and pushing him out of his comfort zone. The uncertainty of how Fester will navigate this opposition adds tension to the scene.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in the scene, with the introduction of Fester adding a new dynamic to the family dynamics and potentially leading to future conflicts and revelations.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing Fester, setting up future conflicts and developments, and deepening the audience's understanding of the characters and their relationships.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it subverts expectations, introduces new conflicts, and keeps the audience guessing about Fester's true intentions and the Addams family's reactions.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between Fester's criminal nature and the Addams family's unconventional values. This challenges Fester's beliefs about right and wrong, as well as his worldview.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, particularly in building intrigue and curiosity about Fester's character and his relationship with the Addams family.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene is effective in conveying the dark humor and suspenseful tone. The interactions between Fester and Wednesday are engaging and reveal important character dynamics.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it combines suspense, humor, and character development to create a compelling and immersive experience for the audience.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing suspenseful moments with character interactions, creating a dynamic rhythm that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue formatting that enhance readability and visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre, effectively building tension and revealing character dynamics through dialogue and action.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, particularly through the juxtaposition of Morticia's casual unpacking of Fester's burglary tools with her nonchalant demeanor. This contrast highlights the absurdity of the situation and reinforces the family's eccentricity.
  • Fester's character is well-established as anxious and paranoid, particularly in his interactions with Wednesday. However, the dialogue could be enhanced to better reflect his internal conflict and fear of being discovered. His reactions to Wednesday's presence are amusing but could delve deeper into his psychological state.
  • The visual elements, such as the photographs of Fester and Gomez as children, effectively set the stage for their backstory and hint at their shared history. However, the significance of these images could be more explicitly tied to Fester's current emotional state, providing a stronger connection between past and present.
  • The pacing of the scene feels slightly rushed, particularly in the transition from Morticia's departure to Fester's encounter with Wednesday. A more gradual build-up to Fester's anxiety could enhance the tension and comedic effect.
  • The introduction of Thing adds a classic Addams Family element of surprise and humor, but Fester's reaction could be more exaggerated to amplify the comedic horror. The scream at the end is effective, but it could be preceded by a more drawn-out moment of suspense to heighten the payoff.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal monologue or dialogue for Fester that reveals his thoughts about being back in the family home and his fears of being discovered. This could deepen his character and make his anxiety more relatable.
  • Expand on the significance of the photographs by having Fester reflect on them or express a desire to reconnect with his past, which could add emotional depth to the scene.
  • Slow down the pacing between Morticia's exit and Fester's encounter with Wednesday. Allow for a moment of silence or a brief internal struggle for Fester to build tension before he peeks out.
  • Enhance Fester's reaction to Wednesday by incorporating more physical comedy or exaggerated expressions to emphasize his discomfort and paranoia, making the scene more visually engaging.
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Fester tries to convince himself that he is safe or that nothing is wrong before the tension breaks with Thing's appearance, creating a more impactful scare.



Scene 18 -  A Chaotic Morning Reunion
43 INT. MORTICIA AND GOMEZ'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 43

Gomez and Morticia snuggle in bed in the afterglow of
their celebration, her head resting dreamily on his
shoulder, Gomez enjoying a post-coital cigar. Fester's
SCREAM is heard distinctly from down the hall.

GOMEZ
My own dear brother. I've got
goosebumps.

MORTICIA
(flirtatiously)
I know.

GOMEZ
Screams in the night. It can only
mean one thing.

They wait, listening. Fester SCREAMS again.

MORTICIA
(smiling)
He's home.

They gaze together out into the torrential downpour as
Fester continues to scream. They both smile.

CUT TO:

44 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - MORNING 44

Obviously moved, Gomez stands in Fester's room, watching
him sleep.

Thing snoozes on Fester's chest like a kitty cat. Gomez
gently lifts him and tucks him into the pocket of his
smoking jacket.

Instantly awake, certain that Gomez is about to attack
him, Fester leaps from the bed, jumps Gomez, and pins
him to the floor. Pulling the knife from his boot, he
presses the blade against his throat.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 35A.

44 CONTINUED: 44

GOMEZ
(very cheerful)
Breakfast?

Gomez JUDO-FLIPS Fester off his chest, then springs to
his feet.

GOMEZ
Damn, it's good to have you back!
Let's go!

He leads the way out. He pauses, and turns.

GOMEZ
Two out of three?

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 36.

A45 INT. THE ADDAMS KITCHEN - LATER A45

The family eats breakfast in the subterranean kitchen.
Only Pugsley is missing. The walls sweat and smoke crawls
along the floor.

Granny works at a stove that's a coal burning monstrosity.
Flames belch out of the oven. The top is a gigantic grill
where innards and various unidentifiable somethings sizzle.
Throughout, Granny flips these offals onto family members'
plates. Lurch assists her.

Morticia has seated Fester between Gomez and herself. She's
given him an elaborate pewter place setting with a dragon
motif, obviously saved for honored guests.

WEDNESDAY
May I have the salt?

MORTICIA
What do we say?

WEDNESDAY
(dutifully)
Now.

Morticia smiles approvingly and passes Wednesday the salt.

FESTER
(staring at the food
on his plate)
What is this?

MORTICIA
Mama's specialite' de la maison.

GRANNY
Start with the eyes.

MORTICIA
(to Fester)
Sleep well?

FESTER
Like the dead.

GOMEZ
Really? Who knew the Bermuda Triangle
could change a man so much? You used
to toss and turn all night. We had to
chain you to the bedposts.

WEDNESDAY
(gazes levelly at
Fester)
It doesn't make sense.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 36A.

A45 CONTINUED: A45

Fester had no idea a simple exchange could be so fraught
with pitfalls. He already feels cornered.

FESTER
(condescendingly to
Wednesday)
The Bermuda Triangle is such a
large and mysterious place. You'd be
surprised at all the things you don't
know.

MORTICIA
She certainly would. Wednesday adores
the Bermuda Triangle. She studies it.
Death at sea - she's hooked.

WEDNESDAY
Ask me anything.

Fester turns his back on Wednesday and addresses Gomez.

FESTER
Being in my old room sure brings back
memories. Remember Camp Custer?

GOMEZ
(aglow)
For pre-teen offenders?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 37.

A45 CONTINUED: A45

FESTER
And I was thinking about Christmas...

GOMEZ
Waiting for Santa to come down the
chimney...

FESTER
(guessing)
Hanging our stockings...

GOMEZ
Building a fire.

Gomez and Fester laugh mischievously.

FESTER
Aren't memories precious? I'd like
to spend today wandering through the
house, remembering.

GOMEZ
No, no, no. Sorry, old man - no
wandering today. Today we're going
straight to the vault.

Pugsley runs into the room, dragging a freshly-stolen STOP
SIGN, still on its pole. Gomez holds up a finger, shushing
everyone.

Just then, the (O.S.) SCREECHING SOUND OF CARS heading for
a collision is heard. Finally, the CARS COLLIDE. There is
a satisfying crunch of metal. Everyone beams.

GRANNY
Who wants seconds?

Something in Granny's soup tureen YELPS. Granny, keeping
her eyes on Fester, jabs her ladle into the tureen.

GRANNY
Don't be shy.

CUT TO:

B45 OMITTED B45
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary Gomez and Morticia enjoy a cozy moment in their bedroom when they hear Fester's screams, signaling his return. After a playful exchange, Gomez checks on Fester, who reacts defensively but is soon invited to breakfast. The family gathers in the kitchen, where Granny prepares a bizarre meal, and Fester feels out of place amidst their reminiscing. Gomez suggests they visit the vault instead of letting Fester wander. The scene concludes with the family delighting in a car crash sound outside, showcasing their unique embrace of chaos.
Strengths
  • Strong character introductions
  • Effective humor and wit
  • Established tone and atmosphere
Weaknesses
  • Limited focus on external conflict
  • Some dialogue may be overly expository

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively introduces Fester, establishes the tone of the Addams family household, and sets up potential conflicts and dynamics. The humor and dark comedy elements are well-executed, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Fester's return and the dynamics within the Addams family are intriguing and engaging. The scene effectively introduces new elements while staying true to the established tone of the story.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses by introducing Fester, setting up conflicts and relationships, and hinting at future developments. While the scene is more focused on character dynamics, it lays the groundwork for upcoming events.

Originality: 9

The scene demonstrates a high level of originality with its fresh approach to family dynamics and dark humor. The authenticity of characters' actions and dialogue adds to the uniqueness of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-defined, with distinct personalities and interactions. Each character contributes to the scene's humor and dynamics, showcasing their unique traits and relationships.

Character Changes: 7

Fester undergoes a subtle change from suspicion to acceptance within the scene, showcasing his initial unease and eventual integration into the Addams family. Other characters also show hints of development and growth.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to reconnect with his brother Fester and welcome him back home. This reflects Gomez's deeper need for family unity and acceptance, as well as his desire to maintain the eccentric Addams Family traditions.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to integrate Fester back into the family and show him love and support. This reflects the immediate challenge of Fester's return and the need to make him feel at home.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are hints of conflict and tension, the scene focuses more on introducing characters and setting up relationships. The conflict is more subtle and serves as a foundation for future developments.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Fester's return presenting a challenge to the Addams Family's dynamics and values, creating tension and conflict that adds depth to the story.

High Stakes: 5

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, there is a sense of intrigue and anticipation regarding Fester's return and his impact on the Addams family dynamics. The scene sets up potential conflicts and challenges.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing Fester, establishing relationships, and hinting at future conflicts. It sets the stage for upcoming events and developments within the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected character interactions, dark humor, and eccentric situations that keep the audience guessing about what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between the Addams Family's dark and unconventional values and the outside world's norms. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in family loyalty and acceptance of individuality.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits amusement, curiosity, and slight suspense from the audience. While it is more focused on humor and character introductions, there are emotional undertones in the interactions and dynamics.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, reflecting the tone of the scene and the characters' personalities. It effectively conveys information, builds relationships, and adds to the comedic elements.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its quirky characters, witty dialogue, and dark humor that captivate the audience and draw them into the Addams Family's world.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and character interactions to maintain audience interest and drive the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with proper scene headings and descriptions that enhance visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene transitions and character interactions that drive the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the Addams family's dark humor and quirky dynamics, particularly through the playful banter between Gomez and Morticia. Their flirtatious exchange sets a light-hearted tone that contrasts well with Fester's screams, creating a comedic juxtaposition.
  • The transition from the bedroom to Fester's room is smooth, maintaining the flow of the narrative. However, the abruptness of Fester's awakening and subsequent attack on Gomez could benefit from a bit more buildup or context to enhance the comedic timing.
  • Gomez's cheerful demeanor in the face of danger is consistent with his character, but the dialogue could be sharpened to heighten the humor. For instance, instead of simply asking about breakfast, a more elaborate or absurd response could amplify the comedic effect.
  • The kitchen scene introduces a chaotic and grotesque atmosphere that is quintessentially Addams. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic, especially during Fester's interactions with Wednesday. Their exchange feels slightly one-dimensional and could use more wit or tension to reflect their characters' complexities.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the introduction of the car crash sound effect feels a bit rushed. It might be more effective to build anticipation before the crash, allowing the audience to savor the moment of chaos that follows.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of hesitation or confusion from Gomez before he cheerfully suggests breakfast, which could enhance the comedic tension of the situation.
  • In Fester's dialogue with Wednesday, inject more sarcasm or dark humor to reflect their shared family traits, making their interaction more engaging.
  • Explore the use of physical comedy during Fester's attack on Gomez. Perhaps include a humorous miscommunication or a slapstick moment that emphasizes the absurdity of the situation.
  • Enhance the kitchen scene by incorporating more sensory details about the food and the cooking process, which could add to the grotesque humor and create a more vivid atmosphere.
  • Consider extending the moment before the car crash sound, allowing for a buildup of anticipation among the characters and the audience, which could lead to a more satisfying payoff.



Scene 19 -  Gondola Adventure in the Secret Chamber
45 INT. DEN - LATER 45

Gomez and Fester are in front of the bookcase THAT'S THE
ENTRANCE TO THE VAULT.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 38.

45 CONTINUED: 45

Gomez reaches for a book. Fester is right there with
him, his hand on Gomez's hand as he goes to pull out the
old volume. Fester reads the title.

FESTER
"Greed."

They share a smile. THE BOOKCASE SWINGS OPEN. Fester
eagerly follows Gomez inside.

CUT TO:

46 OMITTED 46

A47 INT. THE SECRET CHAMBER - MOMENTS LATER A47

Gomez runs gleefully down a flight of STEPS.

GOMEZ
I feel like - we're children again.

Gomez reaches a SMALL CIRCULAR ROOM.

Gomez looks up. Over his head hang HUNDREDS OF RUSTY
CHAINS.

Gomez grabs one of the chains. As he does so, he punches
Fester on the shoulder.

GOMEZ
Tag - you're it!

Gomez pulls the chain, and he and Fester DROP OUT OF VIEW,
through a trap door.


B47 OMITTED B47

C47 INT. BENEATH THE SECRET CHAMBER - SECONDS LATER C47

Gomez and Fester are SLIDING DOWN A TWISTING SLIDE.
Gomez is gleeful; Fester is petrified.

CUT TO:

47 INT. UNDERGROUND RIVER 47

The slide deposits Gomez and Fester on a dock, leading to
the underground river. Gomez is all high spirits, while
Fester is wobbly.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 39.

47 CONTINUED: 47

GOMEZ
(inhaling deeply,
as if in a meadow)
Smell that air, Fester!

Fester inhales dutifully. He gags.

GOMEZ
Like a tomb!

Gomez strides to the end of the dock. Waiting there is a
VENETIAN GONDOLA, rundown but still magnificent. Gomez
does a running leap to board the gondola. He puts on a
straw gondolier's hat and calls out to Fester...

GOMEZ
Tutti a bordo, fratello mio!
(gesturing to the
water)
The sea - your second home.

Fester boards the gondola gingerly, looking queasy.

FESTER
Ship ahoy...

Gomez winds an old Victrola as he sorts through a pile of
78's. He puts the needle down on a record and begins to
sing along in a bellowing basso profundo. He sets sail,
poling down the UNDERGROUND RIVER.

CUT TO:

A48 OMITTED A48
and and
48 48
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary Gomez and Fester stumble upon a hidden vault behind a bookcase, triggered by the title 'Greed.' Filled with childlike joy, Gomez playfully tags Fester before they drop through a trap door, sliding down to an underground river. While Gomez revels in the atmosphere, Fester struggles with the smell. They discover a rundown Venetian gondola, and Gomez, donning a gondolier's hat, invites Fester aboard as he prepares to set sail, singing merrily. The scene captures their playful camaraderie and whimsical adventure.
Strengths
  • Creative concept of a secret chamber
  • Engaging interactions between Gomez and Fester
  • Whimsical and mysterious tone
Weaknesses
  • Mild conflict level
  • Limited emotional depth

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted with a mix of humor, mystery, and fantasy elements that engage the audience and advance the plot.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a hidden vault, playful interactions, and a Venetian gondola ride adds depth and intrigue to the scene, making it memorable and entertaining.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses as Gomez and Fester explore the secret chamber, revealing more about the Addams family's mysterious world and setting up future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to familiar themes, such as exploring hidden chambers and underground rivers within the Addams Family's home. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the scene's originality.


Character Development

Characters: 8

Gomez and Fester's dynamic and playful interactions add humor and depth to the scene, showcasing their unique personalities and relationships.

Character Changes: 6

Fester experiences a mix of nervousness and excitement, showing a slight change in his demeanor as he explores the secret chamber.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to relive a sense of childhood joy and adventure. This reflects his deeper desire for excitement and connection with his family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to explore the secret chamber and underground river. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of uncovering hidden treasures and secrets within their own home.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild conflict between Fester's nervousness and Gomez's excitement, adding tension and humor to the scene.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Fester's cautious nature providing a small obstacle to Gomez's adventurous spirit. The audience is left unsure of how their exploration will unfold.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on exploration and discovery rather than intense conflict or danger.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing more about the Addams family's world and setting up future plot developments with the introduction of the secret chamber.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' actions and the discovery of hidden secrets within the Addams Family home.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between Gomez's carefree and adventurous nature and Fester's cautious and fearful demeanor. This conflict challenges Gomez's belief in embracing life's adventures and Fester's tendency to be more reserved and apprehensive.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of wonder and amusement, engaging the audience emotionally through its whimsical and mysterious elements.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and humorous, reflecting the quirky nature of the Addams family and enhancing the playful tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its whimsical and adventurous tone, quirky character interactions, and mysterious setting. The audience is drawn into the Addams Family's world and their unconventional escapades.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a sense of excitement and intrigue as the characters explore the secret chamber and underground river. The rhythm of the scene enhances the overall tone and atmosphere.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings and descriptions. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear progression of events and character interactions. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, showcasing the playful relationship between Gomez and Fester. However, the transition from the bookcase to the secret chamber could benefit from more visual detail to enhance the sense of wonder and mystery surrounding the vault.
  • Gomez's exuberance contrasts sharply with Fester's apprehension, which is a great dynamic. However, Fester's character could be further developed by adding internal thoughts or reactions that highlight his discomfort in this bizarre environment, making his fear more relatable.
  • The dialogue is minimal, which works for the scene's pacing, but adding a few more lines could deepen the character interactions. For instance, Fester could express his concerns about the vault or the chains, which would add tension and humor.
  • The imagery of the underground river and the gondola is visually striking, but it could be enhanced by describing the atmosphere more vividly. For example, incorporating sounds, smells, or even the eerie reflections in the water could create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • The scene ends with a strong visual of Gomez singing on the gondola, but it might benefit from a more explicit emotional beat. Perhaps Fester could have a moment of realization or acceptance about his place in the family, which would add depth to his character arc.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more descriptive language to the transition from the bookcase to the secret chamber to build anticipation and intrigue.
  • Include Fester's internal thoughts or reactions to the environment to enhance his character development and make his fear more relatable.
  • Add a few lines of dialogue that reflect Fester's concerns or skepticism about the vault, which could create a humorous contrast with Gomez's excitement.
  • Enhance the sensory details of the underground river scene by describing sounds, smells, and visual elements to create a more immersive atmosphere.
  • Incorporate a moment of emotional realization for Fester at the end of the scene to deepen his character arc and connection to the family.



Scene 20 -  Secrets in the Attic and Vault
A49 INT. ATTIC - SAME TIME A49

Wednesday and Pugsley are exploring the attic, investi-
gating various items.

PUGSLEY
Do you think that's really Uncle
Fester?

WEDNESDAY
Father says so, but I think Mother
isn't sure.

Wednesday stands in front of an ELECTRIC CHAIR.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 40.

A49 CONTINUED: A49

WEDNESDAY
Pugsley, sit in the chair.

PUGSLEY
Why?

WEDNESDAY
So we can play a game.

PUGSLEY
(climbing into the
chair)
What game?

WEDNESDAY
It's called...
(she thinks)
"Is there a God?"

CUT TO:


49 INT. ENTRANCE TO THE VAULT - SAME TIME 49

Still singing, Gomez poles toward A MASSIVE METAL DOOR,
SIX FEET ACROSS AND TEN FEET HIGH, set right into the
ROCK OF THE GROTTO. Gomez docks at the narrow ledge in
front of the door.

Gomez leaps onto the ledge and Fester follows. He's
getting excited now, wondering what treasures exist
behind this door.

FESTER
The vault...

Gomez goes to work on the oversized combination lock.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 41 & 41A.

49 CONTINUED: 49
GOMEZ
(knowingly, to
Fester)
Two to the right, ten to the
left, and then around to...?

FESTER
(guessing)
Five?

GOMEZ
(surprised)
Eleven. Two, ten, eleven. Eyes,
fingers, toes.

Fester licks his lips in anticipation.

GOMEZ
So many years...

FESTER
Long, barren years...

GOMEZ
Years that we wasted...

FESTER
Years we'll bring back...

GOMEZ
We enter together - a triumphant
return!

FESTER
We enter as brothers - we enter...

GOMEZ
As one!

Gomez slowly opens the door, revealing...

50 OMITTED 50
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In a whimsical and darkly comedic scene, Wednesday and Pugsley explore the attic, where Wednesday playfully suggests Pugsley sit in an electric chair for a game, while Gomez and Fester excitedly prepare to open a massive vault door, reflecting their shared anticipation and camaraderie. The scene captures the eerie charm of the Addams Family as it balances playful tension with a sense of mystery.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Mystery
  • Character bonding
Weaknesses
  • Low conflict level
  • Limited character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds anticipation and excitement through the discovery of the hidden vault, showcasing the unique bond between Gomez and Fester.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of discovering a hidden vault adds intrigue and depth to the storyline, highlighting the family's mysterious history.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses as the characters uncover the hidden vault, adding a new layer of mystery and setting the stage for future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to exploring philosophical themes within a darkly comedic setting. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The scene showcases the unique relationship between Gomez and Fester, deepening their bond and adding complexity to their characters.

Character Changes: 7

The scene deepens the relationship between Gomez and Fester, showcasing their bond and setting the stage for potential character growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Wednesday's internal goal is to challenge Pugsley's beliefs and provoke philosophical thought. This reflects her desire to question and explore deeper meanings.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to open the vault and discover the treasures inside. This reflects the immediate challenge they are facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is a sense of anticipation and mystery, the conflict is relatively low in this scene, focusing more on discovery and bonding.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing challenges and obstacles that add complexity to the narrative.

High Stakes: 7

While the discovery of the hidden vault is significant, the stakes are relatively moderate in this scene, focusing more on emotional connections.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new element of mystery and discovery, setting the stage for future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected philosophical game introduced by Wednesday, adding a layer of mystery and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between belief in a higher power and skepticism. Wednesday's game 'Is there a God?' challenges traditional beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a sense of nostalgia and excitement, drawing the audience into the emotional journey of Gomez and Fester.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the excitement and anticipation of discovering the hidden vault, enhancing the emotional impact of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, suspense, and philosophical questioning, keeping the audience intrigued and invested.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene builds tension and suspense effectively, leading to a satisfying reveal at the end.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, enhancing the reader's understanding of the action and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively juxtaposes the playful curiosity of Wednesday and Pugsley with the excitement of Gomez and Fester, creating a nice contrast between the children's dark humor and the adults' adventurous spirit. However, the transition between the two scenes feels abrupt. The cut from the children's game to the vault scene could be smoother, perhaps by incorporating a visual or thematic link that ties the two moments together more cohesively.
  • Wednesday's dialogue is consistent with her character, showcasing her morbid curiosity and dark humor. However, Pugsley's response could be more engaging. Instead of simply asking 'Why?', he could express a more vivid reaction to the idea of sitting in an electric chair, which would enhance the comedic effect and deepen his character.
  • The dialogue between Gomez and Fester is filled with excitement and nostalgia, which is great for character development. However, the lines could benefit from more specificity or personal anecdotes that reflect their shared history. This would not only enrich their relationship but also provide the audience with a deeper emotional connection to their past.
  • The phrase 'Years that we wasted...' feels a bit generic. It could be more impactful if it included a specific memory or regret that resonates with both characters, making their reunion feel more poignant. This would also help to elevate the stakes of their adventure into the vault.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the emotional weight of Fester's anticipation could be heightened. Adding a moment of hesitation or doubt from Fester before he fully embraces the excitement could create a more dynamic emotional arc, showcasing his internal conflict about returning to the family.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a visual element that connects the attic scene with the vault scene, such as a sound effect or a shared object that transitions the viewer's focus.
  • Enhance Pugsley's dialogue to reflect more of his personality, perhaps by having him express excitement or fear about the electric chair, which would add depth to his character.
  • Incorporate a specific memory or anecdote in Gomez and Fester's dialogue that highlights their shared history, making their reunion feel more meaningful.
  • Revise the line 'Years that we wasted...' to include a specific regret or memory that resonates with both characters, adding emotional depth to their reunion.
  • Introduce a moment of hesitation or doubt from Fester before he fully embraces the excitement of the vault, which would create a more dynamic emotional arc and showcase his internal conflict.



Scene 21 -  Secrets of the Vault
51 INT. VAULT - SAME TIME 51

Rather than a treasure trove, it looks like A DECREPIT
NINETEENTH CENTURY MEN'S CLUB -- torn red leather chairs
and settees, an assortment of TORTURE DEVICES and HUNTING
TROPHIES. An elaborate bar with a cracked mirror.

GOMEZ
Welcome back!

FESTER
(very disappointed)
Thanks.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 42.

51 CONTINUED: 51

GOMEZ
Our secret place. Sanctus
sanctorum. If these walls could
talk, eh, old man?

FESTER
(looking around,
unsure)
What... what would they say?

GOMEZ
(assumes that Fester
is joking)
You tell me.

FESTER
You go first.

GOMEZ
(gesturing to Fester,
out of respect)
Senior partner...

FESTER
(desperately)
Junior spaceman.

GOMEZ
First a brandy!
(indicating the bar)
Do the honors.
(opening a large
wooden box)
I've got a real treat in store.

FESTER
(grumbling to himself,
as he chooses a
bottle from the bar)
Where is it, you ridiculous imbecile...

There are a half-dozen excellent brandies on the well-
stocked shelf. Fester pockets a silver jigger, then
chooses a bottle AND THE BAR SPINS AROUND with Fester,
revealing...

THE INTERIOR TREASURE ROOM --

A STONE CAVERN stacked high with ADDAMS TREASURE -- gold,
jewels, bizarre but priceless statuary from around the
world.

Fester gets one slack-jawed glimpse and THE BAR SPINS
AGAIN, depositing him back in the OUTER ROOM.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 43.

51 CONTINUED: (2) 51

Gomez has been too busy digging through the box to have
noticed Fester's carousel ride. He turns -- his arms over-
flowing with FILM CANS.

GOMEZ
Showtime!

And, with shaking hands, Fester pours himself a stiff
drink and replaces the bottle on the shelf.

CUT TO:

52 OMITTED 52

A53 OMITTED A53

B53 INT. ATTIC - SAME TIME B53

Wednesday is strapping Pugsley's arms and legs into the
electric chair.

PUGSLEY
But if he's not Uncle Fester, then
who is he?

WEDNESDAY
Somebody else.

Wednesday pushes a button, and the lights on the chair
go on. The entire mechanism hums and vibrates.

WEDNESDAY
It has to warm up.

PUGSLEY
Why?

WEDNESDAY
So it can kill you.

PUGSLEY
(after a beat)
I knew that.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In a decrepit vault resembling a nineteenth-century men's club, Gomez joyfully welcomes Fester back to their secret hideout, while Fester expresses disappointment and confusion. They engage in playful banter about the walls' secrets, and as Fester searches for a drink, the bar spins to reveal a treasure room filled with gold and jewels, leaving him momentarily awestruck. Oblivious to Fester's reaction, Gomez prepares for a show, culminating in his excited declaration of 'Showtime!' as Fester pours himself a drink.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept of the hidden vault
  • Dynamic between Gomez and Fester
  • Mix of humor and mystery
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development beyond Gomez and Fester
  • Mild conflict level

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, intrigue, and character dynamics to create an engaging and entertaining sequence.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the hidden vault and the treasure room adds an element of mystery and excitement to the storyline, keeping the audience intrigued and invested in the plot.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses as the characters discover the hidden vault and interact with the treasures, adding depth to the story and setting up future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and original take on the theme of identity and belonging within a darkly comedic context. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams Family universe.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters of Gomez and Fester are well-developed in this scene, showcasing their unique personalities and relationship dynamics. The interaction between them adds humor and depth to the story.

Character Changes: 6

While there are subtle shifts in Fester's emotions and perceptions, the scene focuses more on discovery and interaction than significant character changes.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal in this scene is to find his place and identity within the Addams Family. He is unsure of his role and is seeking validation and acceptance from Gomez.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to impress Gomez and prove his worth by participating in the Addams Family rituals and activities.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild level of conflict in the scene, mainly revolving around Fester's disappointment and the anticipation of discovering the treasures in the vault.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Fester facing internal and external challenges that add complexity to the narrative.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in the scene, with the discovery of the hidden vault adding intrigue and potential consequences for the characters.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing the hidden vault, setting up future plot developments, and deepening the audience's understanding of the characters.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists and turns in Fester's journey to find his place within the Addams Family.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the theme of identity and belonging. Fester's struggle to find his place within the Addams Family challenges his beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from excitement to disappointment, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and engaging, capturing the essence of the characters and adding to the comedic tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its quirky characters, dark humor, and suspenseful moments that keep the audience intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to a satisfying payoff in the end.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the standard screenplay format, making it easy to read and visualize.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor and whimsical tone characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the playful banter between Gomez and Fester. However, Fester's disappointment feels somewhat underexplored; it would benefit from a clearer emotional context to enhance the audience's understanding of his feelings.
  • The dialogue is witty and fits the characters well, but the exchange about what the walls would say lacks a punch. It could be more impactful if it included a humorous or darkly ironic comment that reflects the Addams family's unique perspective on life and death.
  • The visual transition from the decrepit men's club to the treasure room is intriguing, but it could be more dramatic. The spinning bar is a clever device, yet the reveal of the treasure feels rushed. Taking a moment to let Fester's awe linger before returning to the outer room would heighten the comedic effect.
  • Fester's character is portrayed as nervous and somewhat defeated, which contrasts with Gomez's exuberance. This dynamic is interesting, but it could be enhanced by giving Fester a moment of agency or cleverness that allows him to assert himself, even in a humorous way.
  • The scene ends abruptly with Fester pouring himself a drink and Gomez preparing for a show. While this sets up the next scene, it might leave the audience wanting more closure or a stronger emotional beat. A brief moment of reflection or a humorous comment from Fester could provide a more satisfying conclusion.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two that gives insight into Fester's disappointment, perhaps referencing his expectations versus reality regarding the treasure or the men's club atmosphere.
  • Enhance the dialogue about what the walls would say by incorporating a humorous or darkly ironic line that reflects the Addams family's unique worldview.
  • Allow for a more dramatic pause after the treasure reveal, letting Fester's reaction breathe before cutting back to Gomez. This could amplify the comedic effect of the spinning bar.
  • Give Fester a moment where he cleverly navigates the situation or makes a witty remark, showcasing his character's depth and adding to the humor.
  • End the scene with a stronger emotional or humorous beat, perhaps with Fester making a self-deprecating joke about his situation or expressing a desire to reclaim his identity, which would resonate with the audience.



Scene 22 -  Nostalgic Antics and Accidental Revelations
53 INT. OUTER TREASURE ROOM - SAME TIME 53

Gomez is running home movies. He and Fester sit in side-
by-side armchairs with the stuffing coming out. They
smoke cigars and drink brandy from extra-large snifters.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 43A.

53 CONTINUED: 53

ON THE HOME-MOVIE SCREEN --

The young Gomez and Fester, shark fins strapped to their
backs, sneak around a corner toward a swimming pool crowded
with kids. The film then JUMP CUTS to:

Young Gomez has buried young Fester in the sand at the
beach. Only Fester's head appears from beneath a mound. A
few yards away, a single hand struggles out of the sand,
clearly another person. The film JUMP CUTS to:

A hand-held 16mm camera weaves its way through a group of
ball-goers, finally focussing on a head and shoulders shot
of Gomez and Fester, now in their teens. The Addams boys
look both sinister and dashing in their tuxedos and Gomez
is already smoking his trademark cigar.

GOMEZ
Here! The debutante ball! Remember
that fateful night?

FESTER
(guessing)
Of course... your first cigar...

GOMEZ
What? Come on, old man, I've
smoked since I was five. Mother
insisted.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 44.

53 CONTINUED: 53

ON THE SCREEN --

the boys flank their dates, the TWINS from the pictures on
Fester's bureau -- BEAUTIFUL RED-HEADS with dementia in
their eyes. Throughout the twins are seen only from the
waist up.

FESTER
(covering his
tracks)
Flora and Fauna. Quite the pair,
eh, Gomez?

Gomez sighs, and then becomes extremely dramatic.

GOMEZ
Can you ever forgive me?

FESTER
What?

GOMEZ
I didn't love them. Yet, I wooed
them, both, out of foolish pride.
You were so dashing, you could have
any woman you wanted, dead or alive.
I was jealous, insanely jealous.
I admit that now. But I never meant
to drive you off, not to the Bermuda
Triangle.

FESTER
(holding up a hand,
very gracious)
Water under the bridge. Forgiven.
Forgotten.

Gomez holds out his arms. Fester endures the hug.
Gomez turns the hug into a painful headlock. Fester
gasps for breath.

GOMEZ
(playfully)
Say it! Say the password!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 45.

53 CONTINUED: (2) 53

FESTER
(choking)
The password? I... I...

GOMEZ
(continuing to
choke him)
Come on, stop fooling, you
remember...

FESTER
(turning blue)
Please... I'm choking... please...

Gomez, perplexed, releases Fester.

GOMEZ
You forgot our secret password?
The word we used one hundred times
a day? Our special private name
for each other?

FESTER
(rubbing his neck,
still gasping)
That was a long time ago, we were
children... you almost killed me,
you demented freak...

GOMEZ
(shocked)
Did you say... demented freak?

FESTER
Yes, you demented freak!

Fester has accidentally hit on the password. Gomez
lights up; he flings open his arms.

GOMEZ
(joyously)
Demented freak!

CUT TO:

54 OMITTED 54
and and
55 55
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In the Outer Treasure Room of the Addams Family home, Gomez and Fester watch home movies that highlight their mischievous childhood. As they reminisce, Gomez expresses regret over his jealousy regarding their past romantic interests, leading to playful banter. The scene culminates in a humorous moment where Gomez puts Fester in a headlock, resulting in Fester accidentally revealing their forgotten secret password, 'demented freak.' The tone is light-hearted and nostalgic, showcasing their brotherly affection.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Character development
  • Revealing hidden secrets
Weaknesses
  • Limited conflict
  • Some predictable elements

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, engaging, and provides important character development and plot progression. The mix of humor, drama, and nostalgia keeps the audience entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring the brotherly bond between Gomez and Fester, revealing hidden secrets, and introducing a treasure room is intriguing and well-executed.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses effectively with the revelation of past romantic entanglements, the exploration of the treasure room, and the development of the brotherly relationship between Gomez and Fester.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique characters, quirky dialogue, and a mix of humor and drama that set it apart from conventional family reunion scenes. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, especially Gomez and Fester, with their unique personalities shining through in their interactions. The scene adds depth to their relationship and history.

Character Changes: 7

Gomez and Fester's relationship deepens, revealing hidden aspects of their past and strengthening their bond.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to seek forgiveness from Fester for his past actions and to reconcile their relationship. This reflects Gomez's need for validation and connection with his family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to reminisce about past memories and strengthen the bond with Fester. This reflects the immediate circumstances of their reunion and the challenges of addressing past conflicts.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some conflict between Gomez and Fester in their playful banter, the overall tone of the scene is more light-hearted and nostalgic.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with conflicts arising from past misunderstandings and emotional tensions between the characters. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome of their reconciliation.

High Stakes: 5

While there are some stakes involved in the hidden secrets and past romantic entanglements, the overall tone of the scene is more focused on character development and nostalgia.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing important information about the characters, their relationships, and introducing new elements like the treasure room.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in the characters' interactions and revelations. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the conversation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of forgiveness, jealousy, and familial loyalty. It challenges Gomez's values of pride and loyalty towards his family.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of nostalgia and warmth, especially in the interactions between Gomez and Fester, as well as the revelation of past romantic entanglements.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, engaging, and reveals important information about the characters and their past. The banter between Gomez and Fester is particularly entertaining.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its witty dialogue, emotional depth, and character dynamics. The audience is drawn into the interactions between Gomez and Fester, creating a compelling narrative.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue with action, creating a rhythmic flow that keeps the audience engaged. The scene unfolds at a steady pace, allowing for emotional moments to resonate.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format with clear character interactions and progression of dialogue. It adheres to the expected format for a family reunion scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the playful and darkly humorous tone characteristic of the Addams Family. The dynamic between Gomez and Fester is engaging, showcasing their brotherly bond through both nostalgia and humor. However, the dialogue could benefit from more distinct character voices to further differentiate Gomez's exuberance from Fester's more subdued demeanor.
  • The use of home movies as a storytelling device is clever, allowing for visual humor and backstory without lengthy exposition. However, the transitions between the clips could be smoother to maintain the flow of the scene. The jump cuts feel a bit abrupt and could be enhanced with more context or commentary from the characters as they watch.
  • The emotional stakes in the scene are somewhat low, as the conflict revolves around a humorous misunderstanding rather than a deeper emotional issue. While the playful headlock and password reveal are amusing, they lack a sense of urgency or tension that could elevate the scene. Adding a moment of genuine vulnerability or conflict could deepen the audience's investment in the characters' relationship.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the dialogue could be tightened in places. Some lines feel a bit long-winded, which can detract from the comedic timing. Shortening certain exchanges or adding more punchy one-liners could enhance the humor and keep the audience engaged.
  • The visual elements, such as the home movie clips, are a strong aspect of the scene. However, more descriptive language could be used to paint a clearer picture of the setting and the characters' expressions during the viewing. This would help the audience visualize the scene more vividly and connect with the characters' emotions.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more distinct character voices in the dialogue to highlight the differences between Gomez's exuberance and Fester's more cautious demeanor.
  • Smooth out the transitions between the home movie clips by incorporating more commentary or reactions from Gomez and Fester as they watch, which can enhance the humor and flow.
  • Introduce a moment of genuine vulnerability or conflict between Gomez and Fester to raise the emotional stakes and deepen the audience's investment in their relationship.
  • Tighten the dialogue by shortening certain exchanges or adding punchy one-liners to improve comedic timing and keep the audience engaged.
  • Use more descriptive language to enhance the visual elements of the scene, helping the audience to better visualize the setting and the characters' expressions during the home movie viewing.



Scene 23 -  Electrocution and Auction Antics
A56 INT. ATTIC - SAME TIME A56

The electric chair is really humming. Pugsley now has
the chair's helmet on as well. Wednesday is about to
throw the huge master SWITCH.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 45A.

A56 CONTINUED: A56

PUGSLEY
But why would Dr. Pinder-Schloss
tell a lie?

WEDNESDAY
Because she wants something. Do
you have a last request?

PUGSLEY
Can I have ice cream?

WEDNESDAY
No.

PUGSLEY
(sighing)
Then just do it.

As Wednesday is about to throw the switch, Morticia's
head appears from the trap door.

MORTICIA
Children - what are you doing?

Morticia climbs up into the attic.

WEDNESDAY
I'm going to electrocute him.

MORTICIA
But we're late for the charity auction.

WEDNESDAY
(pleading)
Mother...

Morticia pretends to be stern.

MORTICIA
I said no.

PUGSLEY
(pleading)
Please...

MORTICIA
(a beat)
Oh... all right.

She smiles and flips the switch.

ANGLE on Wednesday's face, as we hear the sound of high
voltage sizzling Pugsley. Wednesday is very solemn, her
usual impassive self, then a smile breaks through.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 45B

56 INT. BAYSHORE WOMEN'S CLUB - LATER 56

C.U. on the FINGERTRAP, jewels glittering.

then

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 46.

56 CONTINUED: 56

MARGARET ALFORD, who

blushes, standing on the auction block as if she were
the item up for auction. She holds her hands aloft,
fingers still ensnared in the ancient finger trap. She
wears the same disheveled dress, unable to disguise its
sleeped-in look.

On the stage beside her, JUDGE WOMACK acts as the event's
auctioneer. He reads into the mike from the catalogue:

JUDGE WOMACK
... encrusted with rubies, and
fifteen emerald chips. It was
donated by Morticia and Gomez
Addams.

Gomez and Morticia sit with their family. They look
around, modestly.

REACTION SHOTS of various people in the crowd, staring at
the Addams family in horror and disbelief.

JUDGE WOMACK
Remember, the money we raise goes
to help those less fortunate.
This year, over half our proceeds
will benefit the elderly and the
mentally disabled.

All the Addamses look at Granny proudly. She beams.

JUDGE WOMACK
I open the bidding at five thousand
dollars.

GOMEZ
Bah! Not enough!

He thrusts up his arm.

GOMEZ
Twenty thousand!

MORTICIA
For the elderly and the insane --
(gazing fondly at
Granny)
They've earned it.

JUDGE WOMACK

is surprised at the bid. Next to him, Margaret looks
confused.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 47.

56 CONTINUED: (2) 56

MARGARET
What are they doing? It's theirs.

Judge Womack gives her a look that says shut up.

ANGLE on Pugsley. He has a PEASHOOTER in his mouth, aimed
at Judge Womack. Wednesday glares at her brother, and
holds out her hand. He sheepishly passes her the
peashooter.

JUDGE WOMACK
I have twenty --

GOMEZ
(interrupts)
Twenty-five!
(to Morticia)
Cara mia...

Fester takes Morticia's opera glasses and peers apprais-
ingly at the glittering finger trap. He smiles greedily.

JUDGE WOMACK
Twenty-five --

MORTICIA

bashfully raises her hand.

MORTICIA
Thirty...
(to Gomez)
Mon sauvage...

MARGARET

pesters the Judge Womack.

MARGARET
(to Judge Womack)
What are they doing?

Judge Womack shushes her.

ANGLE on Wednesday. She now has the PEASHOOTER in her
mouth, aimed at Judge Womack. Granny gives her a stern
look; Wednesday sheepishly hands Granny the peashooter.

GOMEZ

raises his hand.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 47A.

56 CONTINUED: (3) 56

GOMEZ
Thirty-five!
(to Morticia)
Eres divina!

MARGARET

is increasingly agitated.

MARGARET
(to Judge Womack)
But I don't understand...

MORTICIA

raises her hand.

MORTICIA
Fifty!

Morticia has raised her arm. She lowers it, but keeps
it extended for Gomez to kiss. He does so, passionately.

THE FLABBERGASTED JUDGE WOMACK

repeats breathlessly...

JUDGE WOMACK
I have fifty thousand dollars...

MORTICIA
Your turn, my ecstacy.

GOMEZ
It's yours, amore mio.

MORTICIA
You spoil me... mon amour.

Gomez utters a little cry of wild passion.

Judge Womack hammers his gavel, as Margaret's jaw drops.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 48.

56 CONTINUED: (4) 56

JUDGE WOMACK
Sold to Morticia Addams for fifty
thousand dollars!

Judge Womack shakes his head, in disgust. As he does so,
a projectile HITS HIS NECK. He YELPS, and grabs his neck.

ANGLE on Granny, with the peashooter in her mouth; she has
clearly just scored the hit on Judge Womack. She and the
children share a conspiratorial smile.

CUT TO:

57 OMITTED 57
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a darkly comedic scene, Wednesday prepares to electrocute Pugsley in the attic, questioning him about Dr. Pinder-Schloss's motives. Pugsley requests ice cream as a last meal, but Wednesday refuses. Just as she is about to proceed, Morticia interrupts, concerned about being late for a charity auction. After some playful negotiation, Morticia allows the electrocution, and Wednesday gleefully flips the switch, sending high voltage through Pugsley. The scene then shifts to the Bayshore Women's Club, where Morticia and Gomez bid extravagantly on a finger trap, shocking the crowd with their unconventional behavior. The scene concludes with Granny playfully hitting Judge Womack with a peashooter, sharing a conspiratorial smile with the children.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Unique setting and concept
Weaknesses
  • Limited emotional depth
  • Lack of major character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, character interactions, and plot progression in a cohesive and entertaining manner, setting up future conflicts and character developments.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, centered around a charity auction where the Addams family's unconventional behavior contrasts with societal norms, is unique and engaging, adding depth to the overall story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene, focusing on the charity auction and the Addams family's participation, moves the story forward while introducing new conflicts and character dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its darkly comedic take on family dynamics and societal events, with authentic character actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-developed, with distinct personalities and interactions that drive the humor and conflict. Each character contributes to the overall dynamic of the Addams family.

Character Changes: 6

While there are subtle hints at character growth and revelations, the scene focuses more on establishing character dynamics and conflicts rather than significant changes.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to carry out a dark and twisted act of electrocuting Pugsley, reflecting their morbid sense of humor and unconventional values.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to attend a charity auction, showcasing their willingness to participate in societal events despite their eccentricities.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, as the Addams family's unconventional behavior clashes with the expectations of the charity auction attendees, setting the stage for future conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicts arising from the characters' unconventional actions and societal expectations.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, centered around the outcome of a charity auction and the Addams family's reputation, but do not involve life-threatening situations or major consequences.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up future plot developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the characters' unconventional actions and unexpected outcomes, adding excitement and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict revolves around the Addams Family's unique values and behaviors conflicting with societal norms, as seen in their actions at the auction.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a mix of emotions, including humor, surprise, and confusion, but does not delve deeply into emotional depth or character development.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, humorous, and reflective of each character's personality, adding depth to their interactions and driving the narrative forward.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its dark humor, eccentric characters, and unexpected twists, keeping the audience intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, enhancing its overall effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, effectively balancing the protagonist's internal and external goals.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor and whimsical nature of the Addams Family, particularly through the playful interaction between Wednesday and Pugsley. However, the stakes of the electrocution could be heightened to create more tension. As it stands, the scene feels more like a comedic setup than a moment of genuine conflict or danger.
  • Morticia's interruption is a clever way to shift the focus from the impending electrocution to the charity auction, but it could benefit from a stronger emotional connection. Morticia's character is typically more assertive, and her initial sternness feels slightly out of character. A more nuanced reaction could enhance her role as a mother who balances her children's dark humor with her responsibilities.
  • The dialogue is witty and fits the Addams Family's tone, but it could be more dynamic. For instance, Pugsley's request for ice cream is a nice touch, but it could be expanded to include a more elaborate or absurd last request that aligns with the family's eccentricity.
  • The transition from the attic to the charity auction is abrupt. A smoother segue could enhance the flow of the narrative. Perhaps a visual cue or a line of dialogue that connects the two scenes could help maintain the audience's engagement.
  • The auction scene introduces a new setting and characters, but it lacks a clear connection to the previous scene. The audience may feel disoriented without a stronger link between the children's antics and the auction's stakes. Establishing a thematic or narrative connection could enhance coherence.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of hesitation or fear from Pugsley before Wednesday throws the switch, which could heighten the tension and make the eventual electrocution more impactful.
  • Revise Morticia's dialogue to reflect her character's assertiveness and warmth. Perhaps she could express concern for Pugsley while still maintaining her playful demeanor, creating a more relatable maternal figure.
  • Enhance Pugsley's last request by allowing him to suggest something more outrageous or fittingly dark, such as asking for a specific type of ice cream that has a humorous or macabre twist.
  • Create a more seamless transition between the attic scene and the auction by incorporating a visual element, such as a shot of the auction items being prepared, or a line from Morticia that hints at the auction's importance before she leaves.
  • Introduce a brief moment of confusion or surprise among the auction attendees when they see the Addams family, which could serve to heighten the contrast between their eccentricity and the more conventional setting of the charity auction.



Scene 24 -  Trapped in Curiosity
58 INT. DUESENBERG - DUSK 58

CLOSEUP ON THE FINGER TRAP --

The jewels glinting in the passing lights.

FESTER

has his fingers TRAPPED in it. He stares at it, almost
as if he were hypnotized. Morticia, beside him, admires
it also.

MORTICIA
Isn't it too enchanting?

Fester pulls his fingers, trying to free them.

FESTER
How do you take it off?

Morticia releases it for him.

MORTICIA
There's a trick to it. Of course.

Gomez shares a look with Wednesday, then leans forward
from his place on the other side of Morticia and,
eyebrows knitted, frowns at Fester.

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A59 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION - NIGHT A59

Several windows are lit.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 48A.

ALTERNATE SCENE 58...

58 INT. DUESENBERG - DUSK 58

CLOSEUP ON THE FINGER TRAP --

The jewels glinting in the passing lights.

FESTER

has his fingers TRAPPED in it. He stares at it, almost
as if hypnotized.

MORTICIA
Gomez, you shouldn't have. You
bought the fingertrap.

GOMEZ
It's for charity. And it belongs
in the family.

Fester pulls his fingers, trying to free them.

FESTER
How do you take it off?

Morticia releases it for him.

MORTICIA
There's a trick to it. Of course.

Gomez shares a look with Wednesday, then leans forward
from his place on the other side of Morticia and, eye-
brows knitted, frowns at Fester.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 49.

59 INT. DINING ROOM - LATER 59

Gomez's elaborate MODEL TRAIN LAYOUT fills the room.
The LIONEL TRAIN races through the remains of a strip
mined mountain terrace.

Thing gallops into view around one of the mountains, then
paces back and forth in front of Gomez's transformers.

GOMEZ
(ranting to Thing)
'How do you take it off?' That's
absurd! That finger trap was a
party favor at his tenth birthday!

Gomez demonically starts his SECOND TRAIN, setting it on
a sure collision course with the first.

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60 OMITTED 60

A61 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - BEDTIME A61

Preparing to go to the vault, Fester, with cool profes-
sionalism, slips his safe-cracking tools into the
bandoliers strapped across his chest.

He reaches into the drawer for the nitro-glycerine and
comes up with the photo of the young Fester and Gomez
being brought home from Camp Custer by the U.P.S. man.
He stares at the picture, then tosses it aside as if
touching it burned him. He picks up the nitro, and
proceeds with his preparations.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In a whimsical scene set inside a Duesenberg car at dusk, Fester becomes entranced by a jeweled finger trap, getting his fingers stuck. Morticia admires the trap and helps him free himself, showcasing her nurturing side. Gomez watches with concern, sharing a knowing look with Wednesday, hinting at a deeper family history with the trap. The light-hearted tone highlights the family's quirky dynamics, ending with Gomez's bemused frown at Fester's predicament.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Intriguing plot development
  • Humorous dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be too eccentric for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted with a good balance of humor, mystery, and character development. It effectively sets up intrigue and foreshadows future events.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Fester's return and the exploration of family secrets is intriguing and adds depth to the overall story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and sets up future conflicts and developments within the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique situation with the finger trap and explores the characters' reactions in a fresh and entertaining way. The dialogue and actions feel authentic to the eccentric nature of the Addams Family.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions are entertaining and revealing. Fester's return adds a new dynamic to the family dynamic.

Character Changes: 8

Fester undergoes a significant change with his return to the Addams family, setting up potential character development in future scenes.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to understand the finger trap and possibly impress Morticia with his bravery or intelligence. This reflects his desire for acceptance and validation within the family.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to free his fingers from the finger trap. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, particularly with Fester's return and the unveiling of family secrets.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Fester's struggle against the finger trap providing a small obstacle that adds tension and humor.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high with the return of Fester and the unveiling of family secrets, setting up potential consequences for the characters.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, relationships, and mysteries.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected reactions and interactions between the characters, keeping the audience on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Morticia's fascination with the finger trap and Fester's struggle to free himself from it. This challenges Fester's beliefs about his own abilities and Morticia's values of mystery and intrigue.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, particularly in the interactions between the characters and the revelation of Fester's past.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty and humorous, capturing the unique personalities of the characters and adding to the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the unique situation with the finger trap, the quirky characters, and the dark humor that permeates the dialogue and actions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions that keep the scene moving forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with concise descriptions and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a character-driven comedy, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, particularly through the use of the finger trap as a metaphor for Fester's entrapment in his own family dynamics. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic; it feels somewhat flat and lacks the punchy, witty exchanges that are characteristic of the Addams Family.
  • Fester's hypnotized state while staring at the finger trap is an interesting visual, but it could be enhanced by adding more internal conflict or humor. For instance, Fester could express a more exaggerated fascination or confusion about the trap, which would deepen his character and add to the comedic effect.
  • The transition from the finger trap to the next scene is abrupt. While the cut to the exterior of the Addams Mansion is visually effective, it would benefit from a more seamless transition that ties the two scenes together thematically or emotionally.
  • Gomez's frown at Fester adds a layer of concern, but it could be more explicitly tied to the family history with the finger trap. This would provide a richer context for the audience and enhance the emotional stakes of the scene.
  • The alternate version of the scene introduces a charitable aspect to the finger trap, which adds depth to Gomez's character and motivations. However, this motivation could be more clearly articulated in the dialogue to avoid confusion about the significance of the finger trap.
Suggestions
  • Consider rewriting the dialogue to include more clever wordplay or puns that reflect the Addams Family's unique humor. For example, Fester could make a joke about being 'trapped' in the family or the irony of a finger trap being a family heirloom.
  • Add a moment where Fester humorously misinterprets Morticia's explanation of the trick to remove the finger trap, leading to a comedic misunderstanding that showcases his character's quirks.
  • Incorporate a brief flashback or a visual cue that hints at the family history with the finger trap, perhaps showing a younger Fester's experience with it, to enrich the narrative and provide context for Gomez's concern.
  • Enhance the emotional stakes by having Gomez express a more personal connection to the finger trap, perhaps revealing a childhood memory that ties into Fester's current predicament.
  • Consider extending the scene slightly to allow for a more gradual transition to the next scene, perhaps by including a humorous reaction from the family as they leave the Duesenberg, which would maintain the comedic tone while providing a smoother narrative flow.



Scene 25 -  Train Wreck of Emotions
61 INT. DINING ROOM - SAME TIME 61

Puffing black smoke, the model trains race toward one
another, toward the inevitable. His emotions churning
like the locomotive wheels, Gomez rants to Thing.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 50.

61 CONTINUED: 61

GOMEZ
He wore that finger trap for two years!
Mother had to teach him how to eat with his
feet! And the combination, and the
password, and my cigar - and he slept
so well!

Thing paces furiously.

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A62 INT. KITCHEN - SAME TIME A62

Granny sits at the kitchen table, reading cookbooks. There
is a stack of books on the table. Two books are propped
up. Granny reads from the first book; we see the title -
The Joy of Cooking. She turns to the second book; we see
the title - Gray's Anatomy.

The sound of Gomez's trains has begun to RESOUND throughout
the house. As Granny reads, a TRAIN WHISTLE pierces the
night, and the kitchen table shakes. Granny looks up from
her reading.

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62 INT. PUGSLEY'S ROOM - SAME TIME 62

Morticia is seated on the bed; she has a family photo album
on her lap. Wednesday and Pugsley, in pajamas, sit beside
her, looking at the album.

PUGSLEY
(pointing at a picture)
Is that Father, when he was little?

MORTICIA
(also pointing)
Yes. And that's Uncle Fester.

WEDNESDAY
Where are they?

MORTICIA
At a birthday party. See the fire trucks?

From Gomez's train room, we hear a voice howl "ALL
ABOARD!", followed by another WHISTLE BLAST.

MORTICIA
(worried)
Oh, no.

PUGSLEY
Father's playing with his trains.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 50A.

62 CONTINUED: 62

WEDNESDAY
He must be upset.

MORTICIA
It's always a bad sign -- hobbies.

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A63 INT. ADDAMS LIBRARY - SAME TIME A63

Grimly determined, Fester removes the well-worn copy of
"Greed" from the shelf and the secret panel opens. He's
headed for the vault.

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63 INT. DINING ROOM - SAME TIME 63

The model trains WHISTLE AT FULL BLAST, shrieking in
warning as they round Dead Man's Curve, heading for each
other.

FROM INSIDE ONE OF THE TRAINS --

A LITTLE PASSENGER LOOKS OUT. He passes Gomez still
raving, almost to the boiling point.

GOMEZ
These thoughts! I'm in torment!
What is truth? What is fiction?

Thing pounds the table in frustration.

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64 INT. LURCH'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 64

Lurch is sitting up in his too-small bed, wearing his
nightshirt and cap. He is sewing a button on a shirt --
a gentle giant.

The CHUG of the trains now SHAKES the entire house.
Lurch's needle slips from the noise, and he pricks his
finger. He sucks on his finger, looking troubled.

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A65 INT. THE SECRET CHAMBER - SAME TIME A65

Fester is at the INTERIOR WALL. He pushes against it,
seeing if that will make it turn. Then he remembers...
He looks above and there hang...

THE COUNTLESS CHAINS--

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 51.

A65 CONTINUED: A65

each with a rusted metal grip on the end. Which chain to
pull?

From far above in the house, Fester hears the distant
train whistle. He randomly yanks one of the chains.

The CHAIN YANKS BACK, pulling Fester straight upwards.
With a screech of pulleys and geers, the chain rockets
him, hanging on for dear life, toward a NARROW GAP IN
WHAT MAY OR MAY NOT BE A CEILING. Fester disappears into
the gap.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Fantasy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family home, chaos ensues as Gomez becomes increasingly agitated over his obsession with model trains, causing concern among his family. While Granny reads in the kitchen and Morticia worries about Gomez's behavior, Pugsley and Wednesday explore family history. Fester's attempts to access a secret vault lead to unexpected consequences, culminating in his sudden ascent into a narrow gap, all amidst the backdrop of racing trains and a mix of dark humor and tension.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Well-developed characters
  • Witty dialogue
  • Intriguing mystery elements
Weaknesses
  • Potential for confusion with multiple plot threads
  • Some elements may be too fantastical for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, mystery, and family dynamics, creating an engaging and entertaining sequence. The introduction of the secret chamber and treasure room adds depth to the story, while the playful interactions between characters keep the audience entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the secret chamber and treasure room adds depth and intrigue to the story, keeping the audience engaged. The blend of mystery, humor, and family dynamics creates a unique and compelling narrative that sets the scene apart.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and well-developed, with the introduction of the secret chamber and treasure room driving the story forward. The character interactions and comedic elements add depth to the plot, keeping the audience entertained.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a dysfunctional family dealing with chaos in a darkly humorous way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters in the scene are well-developed and engaging, with distinct personalities that drive the narrative forward. The interactions between characters add depth to the story and enhance the comedic and fantastical elements of the scene.

Character Changes: 7

The characters undergo subtle changes in the scene, particularly in their interactions and dynamics with one another. The discovery of the secret chamber and treasure room adds new dimensions to their relationships and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal is to deal with his emotions and inner turmoil, as reflected in his ranting and questioning of truth and fiction.

External Goal: 7

Gomez's external goal is to navigate the chaos caused by his model trains and potentially prevent a collision.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene is primarily driven by the mystery of the secret chamber and treasure room, as well as the dynamics between the characters. The tension and intrigue keep the audience engaged and interested in the outcome.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the potential collision of the model trains creating a sense of urgency and conflict.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes in the scene are moderate, primarily centered around the discovery of the secret chamber and treasure room. The characters' motivations and relationships are at play, adding tension and intrigue to the narrative.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new elements such as the secret chamber and treasure room. The character interactions and discoveries drive the narrative and set the stage for future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the chaotic nature of the model trains and the characters' eccentric actions.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of truth and fiction, as Gomez questions the nature of reality amidst the chaos of the model trains.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, primarily driven by the character interactions and the discovery of the secret chamber and treasure room. The comedic elements and family dynamics add depth to the emotional resonance of the scene.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, humorous, and engaging, capturing the unique personalities of the characters. The interactions between characters are well-written and add depth to the story, enhancing the overall entertainment value.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, tension, and unique character dynamics.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is well-executed, with clear transitions between different locations and characters.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a dark comedy genre, with a blend of chaos, tension, and humor.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the chaotic energy of the Addams Family, particularly through the use of the model trains and Gomez's emotional rant. However, the transitions between the different locations could be smoother to maintain the flow of the narrative. The abrupt cuts might disorient the audience, making it harder to follow the simultaneous actions happening in different parts of the house.
  • Gomez's rant about the finger trap is humorous and fits the Addams Family's dark comedic tone, but it could benefit from more specificity. Instead of general statements about his brother's past, including a specific anecdote or a more vivid description of the finger trap incident could enhance the humor and emotional weight of his frustration.
  • The dialogue between Morticia, Wednesday, and Pugsley is charming and showcases their family dynamic, but it feels slightly disconnected from Gomez's emotional turmoil. Finding a way to weave their conversation more tightly with Gomez's rant could create a stronger thematic connection and enhance the overall tension of the scene.
  • Fester's determination to access the vault is a nice touch, but it feels somewhat rushed. Expanding on his internal conflict or motivations for accessing the vault could add depth to his character and create a more compelling narrative thread. As it stands, his actions feel somewhat disconnected from the emotional stakes established by Gomez.
  • The visual elements, such as the model trains and the chaos they create, are strong, but the scene could benefit from more descriptive language to paint a clearer picture for the audience. For instance, describing the trains' movements and the sounds they make in more detail could enhance the atmosphere and tension.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a specific anecdote or detail about the finger trap incident that Gomez references to deepen the humor and emotional resonance of his rant.
  • Work on the transitions between different locations to create a smoother narrative flow. This could involve using visual or auditory cues that connect the scenes more cohesively.
  • Integrate the dialogue between Morticia, Wednesday, and Pugsley more closely with Gomez's emotional state to enhance the thematic connection and tension in the scene.
  • Expand on Fester's motivations for accessing the vault to provide more depth to his character and create a stronger narrative thread that ties back to Gomez's emotional turmoil.
  • Enhance the descriptive language surrounding the model trains and their chaotic movements to create a more vivid and engaging atmosphere for the audience.



Scene 26 -  Chaos at Dead Man's Curve
B65 INT. PUGSLEY'S ROOM - SAME TIME B65

Morticia and the children are listening to the sounds of
the trains, now a CHUGGING, WHISTLING CACOPHONY.

PUGSLEY
(listening)
He's using the diesel...

A SHRILL BLAST is heard.

WEDNESDAY
The covered bridge...

ANOTHER BLAST.

MORTICIA
(very concerned)
Dead Man's Curve...

WEDNESDAY
I know what he's worried about.

MORTICIA
So do I, darling.
(trying to hide her
anxiety)
But let's get to bed. Now, have you
brushed your teeth and washed behind
your ears?

PUGSLEY
I did. I'm sorry.

Another BLAST.

WEDNESDAY
Is that man really Uncle Fester?

Uncle Fester WHOOSHES through the floor-to-cealing piranha
tank. Only Morticia sees this.
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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 52. & 53.

65 INT. DINING ROOM - SAME TIME 65

The TRAIN CRASH is imminent.

GOMEZ
(falling to his knees)
Spirits above me - give me a sign!
Shall I be joyous? Or shall I be
damned?

The TRAINS COLLIDE!

Metal rends. Smoke and flames.

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66 OMITTED 66

A67 OMITTED A67

B67 OMITTED B67

C67 OMITTED C67

67 OMITTED 67
and and
68 68

69 OMITTED 69
& &
70 70

71 OMITTED 71

72 OMITTED 72
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 54.
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a tense moment at the Addams family home, Morticia and the children anxiously listen to the sounds of an impending train disaster. Pugsley identifies the train type while Wednesday and Morticia express their fears about Dead Man's Curve. Despite the chaos, Morticia tries to keep the children calm as Uncle Fester makes a dramatic entrance. Meanwhile, Gomez desperately seeks a sign from the spirits as the trains collide, resulting in a chaotic scene filled with smoke and destruction.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Mysterious elements
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be confusing without prior context

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, mystery, and family dynamics, with a high-stakes moment adding tension and excitement.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Uncle Fester's return, the family dynamics, and the high-stakes train crash are engaging and well-developed.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses with the introduction of Uncle Fester, the family dynamics, and the train crash, adding depth and intrigue to the overall story.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its blend of dark humor, gothic atmosphere, and unconventional family dynamics. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams Family universe, adding a fresh perspective to familiar themes.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with unique personalities and interactions that drive the scene forward.

Character Changes: 6

There is some character development, particularly with Uncle Fester's return and the dynamics within the Addams family.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to hide her anxiety about the impending train crash from her children. This reflects her desire to protect them from the harsh realities of the world and maintain a sense of normalcy in their unconventional family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to ensure her children are safe and prepared for bed despite the chaos happening outside. This reflects her immediate challenge of balancing her own fears with her responsibilities as a parent.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a moderate level of conflict, particularly surrounding Uncle Fester's return and the high-stakes train crash.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the looming threat of the train crash creating a sense of danger and uncertainty. The characters' conflicting emotions and decisions add to the tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 8

The high-stakes train crash adds tension and excitement to the scene, raising the stakes for the characters.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key elements such as Uncle Fester's return and the high-stakes train crash.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' actions and the looming threat of the train crash. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the theme of family loyalty and protection. Morticia must decide whether to shield her children from the truth or prepare them for potential danger, highlighting the clash between honesty and protection.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a range of emotions, from concern to excitement to amusement, engaging the audience on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reflective of the characters' personalities, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of suspense, humor, and emotional depth. The impending train crash and Morticia's internal struggle create a sense of urgency and intrigue that keeps the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense leading up to the train crash. The rhythm of the dialogue and the characters' actions create a sense of urgency and anticipation.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and impact of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, building tension and suspense leading up to the train crash. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in conveying the characters' emotions and the impending danger.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension through sound, with the cacophony of the trains creating a sense of impending disaster. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic to match the escalating chaos. The characters' responses to the sounds are somewhat subdued, which may not fully convey the urgency of the situation.
  • Morticia's attempt to maintain a calm demeanor while expressing concern is a nice touch, but it could be enhanced by showing more of her internal struggle. Perhaps adding a line that reveals her deeper fears about Gomez's safety could heighten the emotional stakes.
  • Wednesday's line about Uncle Fester feels slightly disconnected from the tension of the scene. It could be more impactful if it directly related to the chaos occurring outside, perhaps suggesting that Fester's presence is somehow linked to the disaster.
  • The transition to the dining room is abrupt. While the cut to Gomez on his knees is visually striking, it would benefit from a smoother connection to the previous scene. A brief moment of silence before the trains collide could amplify the tension.
  • The imagery of the trains colliding is vivid, but the aftermath could be described in more detail to enhance the visual impact. Instead of just stating 'Metal rends. Smoke and flames,' consider incorporating sensory details that evoke the chaos and destruction more vividly.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more dynamic dialogue that reflects the characters' escalating anxiety as the train sounds intensify. This could involve them shouting over the noise or expressing their fears more explicitly.
  • Enhance Morticia's internal conflict by including a line that reveals her deeper fears about the situation, perhaps hinting at past traumas or losses related to family safety.
  • Make Wednesday's line about Uncle Fester more relevant to the chaos, possibly suggesting that his return is somehow linked to the impending disaster, which could create a sense of foreboding.
  • Smooth the transition between the two locations by including a moment of silence or a brief pause before the trains collide, allowing the audience to feel the weight of the moment.
  • Expand on the aftermath of the train collision with more descriptive language that captures the chaos and destruction, using sensory details to immerse the audience in the scene.



Scene 27 -  A Walk Among the Tombstones
73 EXT. YARD - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT 73

A COAL CHUTE set in the side of the house DROPS open
depositing the soaked, disoriented Fester

AT THE FEET OF MORTICIA

Silhouetted by the full moon, she stands regally above
him, waiting for him, her velvet cloak covering her night
clothes.

MORTICIA
(pointedly)
Sleepless night? Walk with me,
Fester.

She turns and glides away. Fester has no choice but to
follow.

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74 EXT. BACK OF HOUSE/THE CEMETERY - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT 74

Morticia leads Fester into the chill of the cemetery.

They follow a path that winds among the ELABORATE TOMB-
STONES of the Addams dead. Gomez's golfballs are
everywhere -- on the ground, in statues' upturned hands,
in their open mouths.

As they pass them, Morticia points out various monuments.
The marble statues look so real they could be alive.

MORTICIA
Aunt Laborgia - executed by a firing
squad. Cousin Fledge - torn limb from
limb by four wild horses. And darling
Uncle Eimar...

Uncle Eimar is a hooded executioner with an upraised ax.
There is an UNEARTHLY MOAN, seeming to come from the tomb.

MORTICIA
Buried alive. Psychopaths, fiends,
mad-dog killers - roots, Fester.
Pioneers. Lest we forget.

Among the statuary is a MARBLE VULTURE, posed with the
dignity of an eagle on a flagpole, but the flagpole
is actually a replica of Fester's bald head.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 55.

74 CONTINUED: 74

MORTICIA
Your beloved Muerto. After you
left, he was simply... a different
vulture. He wouldn't circle. He
wouldn't peck. That's how much
you mean to this family.

They reach the MAUSOLEUM where MOTHER AND FATHER ADDAMS
lie. It stands on a knoll, the HIGHEST POINT IN THE
CEMETERY.

Poison ivy covers the dilapidated Greco-Roman tomb.
Mother and Father Addams have been depicted as a god and
a goddess, charioteers driving their steeds to the
netherworld. Father Addams smokes the ubiquitous Addams
cigar.

Morticia gazes up at the likenesses of Mother and Father
Addams. But Fester averts his eyes -- the faces seem
to be STARING DIRECTLY AT HIM.

MORTICIA
Mother and Father Addams...
Imagine what we owe them. Oh, Fester,
how I wish the children could have
known them better. But tell that to
an angry mob.

She turns to trace the FAMILY CREST, carved into the
mausoleum. THE TOP OF THE CREST IS A VULTURE. THE
BACKGROUND IS COMPOSED OF THREE LION'S HEADS -- IN ONE
PANEL, A HUNTSMAN HOLDS OPEN THE LION'S HEAD; IN
ANOTHER PANEL, THE LION HAS SWALLOWED HIM UP TO HIS
TORSO; IN THE LAST PANEL, THE LION HAS SWALLOWED THE
HUNTSMAN COMPLETELY BUT FOR ONE DANGLING FOOT. ON A
BANNER AT THE BOTTOM IS THE FAMILY MOTTO IN LATIN.

MORTICIA
Three lions rampant. The
vulture ascendant. And our
credo "Sic gorgiamus allos
subjectatos nunc."
"We gladly feast on those who
would subdue us."
(reflective)
Not just pretty words. As an
Addams, you understand completely,
don't you?

She stares levelly at him.

FESTER
As an Addams, yes, I do.

(CONTINUED)
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74 CONTINUED: (2) 74

MORTICIA
(after another beat)
Good night, Fester.

She heads toward the house. She turns.

MORTICIA
Rest in peace.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Horror","Family"]

Summary Fester is dropped into the Addams yard, where Morticia invites him to explore the family cemetery. As they walk, Morticia shares stories of their ancestors and the family's dark legacy, culminating at the mausoleum of Mother and Father Addams. Fester reflects on his identity within the family, and Morticia bids him a chilling farewell, leaving him to ponder his place among the Addams clan.
Strengths
  • Eerie setting in the cemetery
  • Reflective dialogue between Morticia and Fester
  • Exploration of family loyalty and tradition
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Lack of external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines elements of comedy, horror, and family dynamics, creating a rich and engaging atmosphere. The dialogue is witty and reflective, adding depth to the characters and the overall story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring the Addams family's dark and macabre history in a reflective and eerie setting is compelling. The scene effectively conveys themes of loyalty, tradition, and the unique nature of the Addams family.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in this scene focuses more on character development and thematic exploration rather than advancing the main storyline. It adds depth to the characters and provides insight into the family's history and values.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its unconventional setting, dark humor, and unique family dynamics. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams family's established traits.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with Morticia and Fester's interactions revealing their complex relationship and family dynamics. The scene showcases the unique personalities of the Addams family members.

Character Changes: 7

Fester experiences a moment of reflection and connection with his family's history, which hints at potential character growth and development. Morticia's interactions with Fester also reveal her depth and complexity.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to remind Fester of his importance and place within the Addams family, despite his absence. This reflects Morticia's desire for family unity and loyalty.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to guide Fester through the cemetery and remind him of the family's history and values. This reflects Morticia's role as a matriarch and keeper of the family legacy.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is an underlying tension in the scene, the conflict is more subtle and internal, focusing on Fester's internal struggle and the family's dark history. The conflict adds depth to the characters and themes.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Morticia challenges Fester to confront his past and embrace his role within the family. The audience is left wondering how Fester will respond to her guidance.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes in this scene are more internal and emotional, focusing on Fester's connection to his family and the dark history of the Addams family. While not high in traditional action-driven stakes, the emotional stakes are significant.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene does not significantly advance the main plot, it provides important insights into the characters and themes of the story. It adds depth and complexity to the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 7.5

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in dialogue, the eerie setting, and the mysterious interactions between characters. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams family's unique values and traditions, which may seem dark and unconventional to outsiders. Morticia challenges Fester to embrace these values and understand the importance of family loyalty.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including nostalgia, reflection, and a hint of sinister undertones. The interactions between Morticia and Fester add emotional depth to the characters.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, reflective, and in line with the dark humor of the Addams family. It adds depth to the characters and conveys important themes and emotions.

Engagement: 8.5

This scene is engaging because of its dark and mysterious atmosphere, compelling character interactions, and intriguing family dynamics. The dialogue and setting draw the audience into the Addams family's world.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a gradual reveal of information and character motivations. The rhythm of the dialogue and action enhances the scene's impact.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and character dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly whimsical tone characteristic of the Addams Family, with Morticia's regal presence and Fester's disoriented state creating a strong visual contrast. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext to deepen the emotional stakes between Morticia and Fester, particularly regarding their shared family history.
  • Morticia's monologue about the family's dark legacy is engaging, but it risks feeling overly expository. While it is important to convey the Addams family's history, consider weaving in more subtle hints or anecdotes that reveal character traits or past events without directly stating them.
  • The imagery of the cemetery and the descriptions of the tombstones are vivid and fitting for the Addams Family aesthetic. However, the scene could be enhanced by incorporating more sensory details, such as sounds or smells, to immerse the audience further into the eerie atmosphere.
  • Fester's character is portrayed as somewhat passive in this scene, following Morticia without much agency. To create a more dynamic interaction, consider giving Fester a moment of resistance or a personal reflection that showcases his internal conflict about returning to the family.
  • The ending line, 'Rest in peace,' is a clever play on words, but it could be more impactful if it were delivered with a stronger emotional weight or a hint of irony that reflects Morticia's complex feelings about family and mortality.
Suggestions
  • Add more subtext to Morticia and Fester's dialogue to reveal their emotional states and the complexities of their relationship.
  • Incorporate more sensory details to enhance the atmosphere of the cemetery, making it feel more immersive and alive.
  • Consider giving Fester a moment of agency or reflection that allows him to express his feelings about being back with the family, adding depth to his character.
  • Revise Morticia's monologue to include anecdotes or hints about the family's history rather than direct exposition, making it feel more organic.
  • Strengthen the emotional impact of the final line by infusing it with irony or a deeper reflection on Morticia's feelings about family and legacy.



Scene 28 -  A Recipe for Concern
75 INT. HALLWAY - EARLY MORNING 75

Fester is on the phone hunched over, his eyes darting to
make sure no one overhears.

FESTER
(into phone)
They're on to me, Mother! I'm almost
sure!... Of course, I've tried, I still
can't find it... you've got to get
over here.

Wednesday is bound and gagged on a chair in the background.
Pugsley runs up to Fester with two bottles of poison.
Fester, vaguely impatient, points to one. Pugsley nods and
runs off.

FESTER
(into phone)
... Don't say that...
(tenderly)
... You know that I do...

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A76 OMITTED A76

B76 INT. ADDAMS KITCHEN - A FEW MINUTES LATER B76

Granny and Lurch are doing the dishes; Granny rinses and
Lurch dries. Lurch then hands each dish to Thing, who
stacks them.

Morticia sits at the kitchen table, sipping a cup of tea.

Wednesday stands before Morticia, holding up a large,
nasty-looking carving knife.

MORTICIA
(to Wednesday)
Is that for your brother?

Wednesday nods.

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B76 CONTINUED: B76

MORTICIA
(taking the knife)
I don't think so.

Morticia hands Wednesday a much larger, even nastier-
looking knife. Wednesday takes the knife and exits.

MORTICIA
(worried)
His trains are everywhere, the children
are beside themselves - this can't go on.
How can I help him? Tell me, Mama.

GRANNY
Well, let's look it up.

Granny wipes her hands and opens a large, ragged leather-
bound book. She starts thumbing through the pages.

GRANNY
Troubled husbands, troubled husbands...
adultery...

MORTICIA
Oh, no.

GRANNY
(still looking)
Financial, money troubles...

MORTICIA
No.

GRANNY
(still looking)
Turned into a toad or reptile...

MORTICIA
Is there an index?

GRANNY
Here it is - suspicion and anxiety,
in husbands.

MORTICIA
(eagerly)
What does it say?

(CONTINUED)
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B76 CONTINUED: B76

GRANNY
(reading)
Drain all his blood, replace it with
vinegar overnight. Leave a headless
rooster beneath his pillow. Smear his
forehead, palms and feet with the tears
of a stillborn monkey. Add milk.

MORTICIA
(offended)
I can't do that. It's barbaric. Really,
Mama. I'm surprised at you.
(a beat, then disdainfully)
Milk.

Lurch growls in agreement.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a darkly comedic scene, Fester anxiously speaks on the phone about a secretive issue while Wednesday is bound and gagged in the background. Pugsley brings Fester poison, which he selects, heightening the tension. Meanwhile, in the kitchen, Morticia worries about her children's behavior, particularly Pugsley's, and seeks advice from Granny. As Wednesday approaches with a carving knife, Morticia replaces it with a larger one, showcasing the family's bizarre dynamics. Granny's unconventional remedies, especially the absurd suggestion of using milk, leave Morticia both desperate and offended, blending tension with absurdity.
Strengths
  • Dark humor
  • Character interactions
  • Unique family dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Potential for confusion with multiple subplots

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, tension, and character development, providing insight into the Addams family dynamics while advancing the plot.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene revolves around family secrets, dark solutions, and the unique dynamics of the Addams family. It effectively explores themes of loyalty, eccentricity, and problem-solving.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene focuses on Morticia's concern for Gomez and the family's unconventional methods of dealing with problems. It adds depth to the characters and sets up future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh and original take on family dynamics and problem-solving, with unique and unconventional solutions to the characters' challenges. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, each showcasing their unique quirks and personalities. Morticia's dilemma and the children's mischievousness add layers to the scene.

Character Changes: 6

While there are subtle shifts in character dynamics, particularly with Morticia's concern for Gomez, the scene focuses more on showcasing the characters' quirks and interactions.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to protect himself and his family from potential danger, reflecting his deep-seated fears of being discovered and his desire to maintain the status quo.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to find a solution to the problem he is facing, which involves his mother and potential threats to his family.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily revolving around Morticia's concern for Gomez and the family's unorthodox methods of dealing with problems.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing challenges and obstacles that add complexity and suspense to the narrative.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are moderate in the scene, with Morticia's concern for Gomez and the family's unconventional problem-solving methods adding tension and humor.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by deepening the audience's understanding of the Addams family dynamics and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected solutions and actions taken by the characters, adding a sense of suspense and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams Family's unconventional beliefs and practices clashing with societal norms and expectations. This challenges Morticia's values and worldview as she navigates how to help Fester.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a mix of negative and amused emotions from the audience, adding depth to the characters and their relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and reflective of the characters' personalities. It adds humor and depth to the scene, enhancing the interactions between the family members.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dark humor, suspenseful elements, and intriguing character dynamics that keep the audience invested in the unfolding events.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue, action, and character interactions to maintain tension and momentum.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions and character interactions that drive the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene effectively maintains the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the juxtaposition of Fester's serious phone call with the absurdity of Wednesday being bound and gagged in the background. This contrast highlights the family's eccentricity and sets a whimsical tone.
  • Fester's dialogue on the phone is intriguing, hinting at a deeper plot involving his mother and a sense of urgency. However, the stakes could be raised further by providing more context about what he is searching for and why it is so critical, which would enhance the tension.
  • The introduction of Pugsley with the bottles of poison adds a layer of dark comedy, but it feels slightly disconnected from the main action. It would be beneficial to clarify Pugsley's intentions or how this ties into Fester's predicament, creating a more cohesive narrative thread.
  • Morticia's interaction with Granny in the kitchen is humorous and showcases their relationship well. However, the dialogue could be tightened to enhance the comedic timing. Some lines feel a bit lengthy and could be trimmed for a snappier exchange.
  • The remedies suggested by Granny are amusing and fit the Addams Family's tone, but they could be more outrageous or bizarre to amplify the humor. The mention of milk feels particularly mundane compared to the other suggestions, which could be replaced with something more grotesque or absurd.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two to Fester's phone conversation that hints at the nature of the 'something important' he is trying to find. This will create intrigue and give the audience a clearer understanding of the stakes.
  • Clarify Pugsley's role in the scene by adding a line that indicates why he is bringing poison to Fester. This could tie into the plot more effectively and enhance the dark humor.
  • Tighten the dialogue between Morticia and Granny by removing any unnecessary words or phrases. Aim for a rhythm that enhances the comedic timing, making the exchange feel more dynamic.
  • Enhance the absurdity of Granny's remedies by brainstorming even more outrageous suggestions that fit the Addams Family's dark humor. This will keep the audience engaged and amused.
  • Consider ending the scene with a stronger visual or comedic punchline that ties back to Fester's phone call or the chaos in the kitchen, leaving the audience with a memorable image or line.



Scene 29 -  Dueling Doubts
C76 INT. UNCLE FESTER'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME C76

Fester is sitting on the bed, kneading his hands, very
upset. Abigail is calmly inspecting the room, studying
various objects with disdain.

FESTER
They know I'm a fraud! The whole
bunch! It's not going to work!

ABIGAIL
Who knows? Gomez, that over-heated
moron?

FESTER
He's no moron! He's Fester's brother,
they had some awful fight, years ago.
He's suspicious, they all are, I can
tell.

ABIGAIL
Really? Well, thank God I came over.
I can counsel the troubled family. Ease
their distress. It's my calling.
Remember, Gordon...

FESTER
What?

ABIGAIL
(smiling)
I'm a doctor.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/15/91 56C.

76 INT. ADDAMS DRAWING ROOM - A FEW MINUTES LATER 76

Gomez and Morticia sit with Abigail.

MORTICIA
(to Gomez)
Dr. Pinder-Schloss is here to help.
(to Abigail)
Should Gomez speak with Fester?
He's right outside the door.

(CONTINUED)
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76 CONTINUED: 76

GOMEZ
I would speak with Fester...

Gomez gets up and stalks toward the door, talking louder
and louder.

GOMEZ
-- if that were Fester, but
that's not! That's an impostor!
An impostore!

OUTSIDE THE DOOR --

Fester hears and STORMS OFF.

77 INT. UPSTAIRS HALLWAY - SAME TIME 77

Fester is marching toward his room, when he hears...

WEDNESDAY (O.S.)
O villain, villain, smiling, damned
villain!

PUGSLEY (O.S.)
Who calls me a villain? Breaks my
pate across? Plucks off my beard
and blows it in my face?

WEDNESDAY (O.S.)
If I must strike you dead, I will!

Fester gets a genuine gleam in his eye.

FESTER
Bloodshed!

He hurries back to the

78 TOP OF THE STAIRCASE and looks down into the 78

FRONT HALL

where, SWORDS DRAWN, DUELLING, Wednesday backs Pugsley in.

Pugsley and Wednesday thrust and parry, hack and slice.
Pugsley runs Wednesday through. She staggers, then falls
dead.

FESTER
No! No! Gimme that sword.

Pugsley hands him the sword.

(CONTINUED)
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78 CONTINUED: 78

FESTER
Haven't you ever slaughtered anyone?

WEDNESDAY
(referring to Pugsley,
solemnly)
He's only a child.

FESTER
No excuse.
(pointing the sword
at Wednesday's throat)
Aim for a major artery. The jugular.

WEDNESDAY
(agreeing, the sword
still to her throat)
That's what I said.
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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In Uncle Fester's bedroom, he grapples with anxiety over being exposed as a fraud, while Abigail, posing as a doctor, tries to reassure him. Meanwhile, Gomez suspects Fester is an impostor and confronts him, prompting Fester to storm off. He is soon drawn to the chaotic duel between Wednesday and Pugsley, where he eagerly joins in, showcasing the Addams family's dark humor and playful violence.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Engaging plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Some elements of the scene may be predictable
  • Lack of deeper emotional depth in certain moments

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, mystery, and character dynamics to create an engaging and entertaining sequence.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on Fester's identity crisis and the family's reaction, is intriguing and well-developed.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene, revolving around Fester's deception and the family's suspicions, is engaging and moves the story forward.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on family dynamics and identity struggles, with authentic character actions and dialogue that align with the Addams Family's established world.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions are entertaining and engaging.

Character Changes: 7

Fester experiences a moment of realization and vulnerability, leading to a potential change in his character.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to prove himself as a legitimate member of the family and overcome his feelings of inadequacy and impostor syndrome.

External Goal: 7.5

Fester's external goal is to gain the trust and acceptance of the Addams Family by convincing them of his true identity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily driven by Fester's deception and the family's suspicions.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Fester facing challenges from both external suspicions and internal doubts, creating uncertainty for the audience.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are moderately high, as Fester's deception could have significant consequences for the family.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing Fester's true identity and setting up future conflicts.

Unpredictability: 8

The scene is unpredictable in its character interactions and outcomes, adding to the tension and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of identity, trust, and family loyalty. Fester's struggle to prove himself challenges the Addams Family's beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a mix of emotions, including humor, suspense, and a touch of tension.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reveals insights into the characters' personalities.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its mix of humor, drama, and suspense, keeping the audience invested in Fester's internal and external struggles.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, leading to a climactic moment that propels the story forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to industry standards and enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure that builds tension and conflict effectively, fitting the expected format for a dark comedy genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through Fester's excitement about bloodshed and the playful banter between him and the children. However, the transition from Fester's anxiety about being discovered as a fraud to his eagerness for violence feels abrupt. This could be smoothed out by adding a line or two that connects his fear to the thrill of the duel, perhaps suggesting that he sees the duel as a way to prove himself or distract from his worries.
  • Abigail's character is introduced as a manipulative figure, but her motivations could be clearer. While she claims to be a doctor, her true intentions seem to be more self-serving. Adding a line that hints at her ulterior motives could enhance her character and create more tension in the scene.
  • The dialogue is witty and fits the tone of the Addams Family, but it could benefit from more subtext. For instance, when Fester expresses his concern about being a fraud, it could be interesting to have him reveal a deeper insecurity about his identity, which would add emotional weight to his character.
  • The physicality of the duel between Wednesday and Pugsley is engaging, but the stakes could be raised. Perhaps Fester could suggest a more dangerous or absurd consequence for losing the duel, which would align with the Addams Family's penchant for dark humor and elevate the tension.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the transition from Fester's internal conflict to the external action of the duel could be more seamless. Consider using a visual cue or sound effect that bridges these two moments, enhancing the flow of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Add a line or two that connects Fester's anxiety about being discovered to his excitement for the duel, creating a smoother transition between his emotional states.
  • Clarify Abigail's motivations by including a hint of her ulterior motives, which would add depth to her character and increase tension.
  • Incorporate subtext into Fester's dialogue about his fears, revealing deeper insecurities that would resonate with the audience.
  • Raise the stakes of the duel by suggesting a more dangerous or absurd consequence for losing, enhancing the dark humor and tension.
  • Use a visual cue or sound effect to bridge the transition from Fester's internal conflict to the external action of the duel, improving the scene's flow.



Scene 30 -  Understanding Love and Resentment
79 INT. DRAWING ROOM - SAME TIME 79

Gomez is still raving...

GOMEZ
...A faker! A phony! An utter
fraud! A base, deceitful--

ABIGAIL
(interrupting)
Mr. Addams, I beleef I am under-
standink. I vill help. Jais? Ze
theory of displacement - is zis
familiar?

GOMEZ
(impressed)
No. Tish?

Morticia shakes her head.

ABIGAIL
Ha! It is too exciting. I vill
explain.

GOMEZ
(excited)
Is it unpleasant?

ABIGAIL
Deeply.

Gomez sits beside Morticia; he takes her hand. They are
both fascinated.

(CONTINUED)
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79 CONTINUED: 79

ABIGAIL
Your very own bruzzer - you drive
him avay. Go! Off viz you! But
zen - you are feelink ze little
black monster.

GOMEZ
Pugsley?

ABIGAIL
Guilt. Jais! Your bruzzer returns,
you feel guilty - you displace.

GOMEZ
I do?

MORTICIA
(impressed)
Of course...

ABIGAIL
Ze feelinks in your brain cells,
ze bubble and ze collide. You suspect
tinks. You luff him, but you resent
him. Luff, hate, hate, luff. Like
for Mama, no?

GOMEZ
But... I didn't hate my mother. It
was an accident.

ABIGAIL
It is a very common psychosis. I
am seeink it every day.

MORTICIA
(sincerely)
Lucky doctor.

GOMEZ
Displacement! How bizarre... and
here, I imagined Fester was the
problem. He's sullen...

MORTICIA
(egging him on)
He's furtive...

GOMEZ
(excited)
He's backstabbing...

MORTICIA
He sulks...

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 59A.

79 CONTINUED: (2) 79

GOMEZ
I suspect him...

MORTICIA
You're unbalanced...

GOMEZ
And I hate him...

MORTICIA
(decisively)
But that's love!

GOMEZ
(jumping to his feet)
By God, you're right! He is
Fester!

Gomez is suddenly jubilant again.

MORTICIA
Thank you, Dr. Pinder-Schloss.

ABIGAIL
I do vat I can.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 60.

80 OMITTED 80
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family's drawing room, Gomez vents his frustration over a perceived fraud, only to be interrupted by Abigail, a doctor who introduces the concept of displacement. She helps Gomez and Morticia navigate Gomez's conflicting feelings towards his brother Fester, revealing that his resentment is intertwined with love. As they engage with Abigail's insights, Gomez experiences a joyful epiphany about Fester's true nature, culminating in a heartfelt thanks to Abigail.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Character development
  • Humorous tone
Weaknesses
  • Mild conflict
  • Lack of high stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, character development, and plot progression, making it engaging and entertaining.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of displacement in relationships is explored in a unique and entertaining way, adding depth to the characters' dynamics.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses as the characters' true feelings are revealed, adding layers to the story and setting up future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on family dynamics and psychological themes, combining dark humor with emotional depth. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and original, contributing to the scene's uniqueness.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' personalities shine through in their interactions, showcasing their quirks and relationships in an engaging manner.

Character Changes: 7

The characters' feelings and relationships evolve throughout the scene, leading to a better understanding of their dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal is to understand his own emotions and relationships with his family members, particularly his brother Fester. This reflects his need for self-awareness and emotional connection.

External Goal: 7

Gomez's external goal is to solve the mystery of his brother Fester's behavior and reconcile his conflicting feelings towards him. This reflects the immediate challenge of family dynamics and trust.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild conflict between the characters due to their hidden feelings and misunderstandings, adding tension to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting emotions and revelations challenging the characters' beliefs and relationships. The audience is left unsure of how the conflicts will be resolved.

High Stakes: 5

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, the emotional and relational dynamics between the characters add depth to the story.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing important information about the characters and setting up future conflicts.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in character emotions and revelations. The audience is kept on their toes as the dynamics between the characters shift.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the complexities of love, guilt, and resentment within family relationships. It challenges Gomez's beliefs about his own emotions and the nature of familial bonds.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a range of emotions from amusement to concern, engaging the audience on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reveals important information about the characters' emotions and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its witty dialogue, dramatic revelations, and emotional depth. The characters' interactions and psychological insights keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and emotional depth, with a balance of dialogue and character interactions that keep the story moving forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a dialogue-heavy scene, with clear character cues and scene descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a character-driven dialogue scene, with clear character motivations and conflicts driving the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the Addams Family's signature blend of dark humor and absurdity, particularly through Gomez's exaggerated emotional responses and Abigail's quirky demeanor. However, the dialogue could benefit from more distinct character voices to enhance their individuality.
  • Abigail's character is introduced with a strong accent, which adds to her eccentricity, but her dialogue sometimes feels overly expository. While it's important to convey the theory of displacement, the explanation could be more concise and integrated into the characters' interactions rather than feeling like a lecture.
  • Gomez's emotional journey from suspicion to jubilation is engaging, but the transition could be smoother. The shift from his accusations to his realization about Fester feels a bit abrupt. More internal conflict or hesitation from Gomez could enhance the emotional stakes.
  • Morticia's role in the scene is supportive, but she could be given more agency. Instead of merely echoing Gomez's thoughts, she could contribute her own insights or challenge Gomez's assumptions, which would deepen their dynamic.
  • The pacing of the scene is uneven. The buildup to Gomez's realization is effective, but the dialogue could be tightened to maintain momentum. Some lines could be trimmed or rephrased for clarity and impact, ensuring that the humor lands without dragging the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider giving each character a more distinct voice in their dialogue. This could involve varying sentence structure, vocabulary, or even the rhythm of their speech to reflect their personalities more clearly.
  • Streamline Abigail's explanation of displacement. Instead of a lengthy exposition, consider breaking it up with more interactive dialogue that allows Gomez and Morticia to react and engage with the concept in real-time.
  • Add a moment of hesitation or doubt for Gomez before he jumps to the conclusion that Fester is indeed his brother. This could involve a brief internal monologue or a visual cue that shows his struggle with conflicting emotions.
  • Empower Morticia by allowing her to challenge Gomez's assumptions or provide a counterpoint to his accusations. This would not only strengthen her character but also create a more dynamic interaction between the two.
  • Revise the pacing by tightening the dialogue. Look for lines that can be shortened or combined to keep the energy high and maintain the comedic rhythm of the scene.



Scene 31 -  Explosive Curiosity
A81 INT. WEDNESDAY'S ROOM - SAME TIME A81

Fester is seated on a leather couch; Pugsley and
Wednesday are snuggled up on either side. They are all
looking at an enormous, ancient BOOK which Fester holds
open in his lap.

C.U. on the book's cover. The title reads WOUNDS, SCARS
AND GOUGES.

FESTER
You see, children? There's a lot
to learn.
(turning the page)
Gangrene.

PUGSLEY
Uncle Fester, how do you know so
much?

FESTER
I've been around. I pick things up.

WEDNESDAY
(still suspicious)
In the Bermuda Triangle?

FESTER
(ignoring her,
turning another
page)
Look, children - a new chapter!

PUGSLEY
Oh, boy!

FESTER, PUGSLEY AND WEDNESDAY
(enthralled)
Scabs.

CUT TO:

B81 OMITTED B81

An EXPLOSION fills the screen, as dirt and debris go
flying. As the smoke clears -

ANGLE ON Fester, crouched over a detonator, he has
clearly just caused the explosion. Wednesday and
Pugsley stand or crouch beside him.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 60A.

B81 CONTINUED: B81

FEATER
Three parts dynamite, with a
nitroglycerin cap. It's perfect
for small homes, carports and
toolsheds.

WEDNESDAY
What about picnics?

Fester smiles approvingly. He reaches into a crate and
holds up a HAND GRENADE. The children's eyes sparkle,
as if it were Christmas Day.

ANGLE on the window of FESTER'S ROOM, high above Fester
and the children. Abigail stands at the window, look-
ing out. She is not pleased.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Dark Comedy","Family","Horror"]

Summary In this darkly comedic scene, Fester shares his macabre knowledge about gangrene with Pugsley and Wednesday while seated on a leather couch. Their fascination escalates when Fester detonates an explosive, revealing a hand grenade that delights the children. Meanwhile, Abigail disapproves from the window, highlighting the conflict between the children's excitement for dangerous knowledge and her concern.
Strengths
  • Effective blend of dark humor and family dynamics
  • Engaging character interactions
  • Unique teaching method of Uncle Fester
Weaknesses
  • Limited focus on intense conflict or high stakes
  • Abigail's disapproval could be further explored

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines dark humor, family dynamics, and a touch of suspense, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Uncle Fester teaching the children about dark subjects while engaging in dangerous activities fits well within the Addams Family universe. It adds depth to the characters and showcases their unique interests.

Plot: 7

While the plot in this scene is not heavily focused, it serves to further develop the characters of Uncle Fester, Wednesday, and Pugsley, setting the stage for future interactions and conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its approach to parenting and family dynamics, presenting a darkly comedic take on unconventional relationships. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Uncle Fester, Wednesday, and Pugsley are well-defined in this scene, each showcasing their distinct personalities and interests. Uncle Fester's eccentricity, Wednesday's curiosity, and Pugsley's enthusiasm are highlighted effectively.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it sets the stage for potential growth and conflicts in future interactions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to educate and bond with the children, showcasing his knowledge and experience. This reflects his desire for connection and validation from his family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to teach the children about explosives and dangerous items, reflecting his unconventional approach to parenting and his desire to share his interests with them.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is a subtle conflict between Abigail's disapproval and Uncle Fester's activities, the scene primarily focuses on character interactions and dark humor rather than intense conflict.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Uncle Fester's unconventional parenting methods challenge traditional values and safety concerns.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes in this scene are relatively low, focusing more on character interactions and dark humor rather than intense drama or conflict.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by further developing the characters of Uncle Fester, Wednesday, and Pugsley, setting up potential conflicts and interactions in the future.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and dialogue, such as Uncle Fester teaching the children about explosives in a playful manner.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between safety and danger, as Uncle Fester introduces the children to potentially harmful items. This challenges the traditional values of safety and protection in parenting.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including curiosity, amusement, and a hint of suspense, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, darkly humorous, and reflective of the Addams Family's unique style. It adds depth to the characters and enhances the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of dark humor, eccentric characters, and unexpected situations. The dialogue and actions keep the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and humor, with a balance of slower moments for dialogue and faster moments for action.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene aligns with the expected format for a screenplay in the dark comedy genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a dark comedy, with a balance of humor and macabre elements. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, showcasing Fester's eccentricity and the children's fascination with morbid subjects. However, the transition from the book about gangrene to the explosion feels abrupt and could benefit from a smoother narrative flow.
  • Fester's dialogue is consistent with his character, but the line 'I've been around. I pick things up.' lacks specificity and could be more engaging. It feels like a missed opportunity to delve deeper into Fester's backstory or experiences that led him to this knowledge.
  • Wednesday's suspicion adds a layer of intrigue, but her line about the Bermuda Triangle could be more impactful if it were tied to a specific event or anecdote from Fester's past. This would enhance the character dynamics and provide more context for her skepticism.
  • The explosion serves as a strong visual gag, but it might overshadow the preceding dialogue. The humor could be better balanced by ensuring that the explosion feels like a natural progression of the scene rather than a sudden jolt.
  • Abigail's disapproval is introduced but not explored in this scene. It would be beneficial to hint at her motivations or concerns regarding Fester's influence on the children, which could create additional tension and foreshadow future conflicts.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of dialogue or action that connects Fester's knowledge of gangrene to the explosion, creating a more cohesive narrative thread.
  • Enhance Fester's line about his experiences by incorporating a humorous anecdote or a specific detail that illustrates his past, making it more memorable and engaging.
  • Expand on Wednesday's skepticism by having her reference a specific story or event related to Fester's past, which would deepen their relationship and add complexity to the scene.
  • To maintain the comedic tone, consider inserting a humorous reaction from Pugsley or Wednesday immediately after the explosion, which could help balance the shock with laughter.
  • Introduce Abigail's character more clearly by having her express a specific concern about Fester's activities, setting up a conflict that can be explored in later scenes.



Scene 32 -  Conflicted Loyalties
81 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - A FEW MINUTES LATER 81

ABIGAIL
(in her real voice)
Everyone will be at the children's
play tonight, correct?

FESTER
Oh, yes. I've been working with
them. It's going to be fun!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/14/90 61.

81 CONTINUED: 81

ABIGAIL
(livid)
Fun? Fun? Is that what we're here
for? FUN?

She SLAPS Fester. Then she immediately grabs him and
hugs him.

ABIGAIL
Darling, I'm sorry! You see what
they've driven me to? I've raised
a hand to my child, my reason to
live. You can't go to the play.

FESTER
But... the kids...

ABIGAIL
The house will be deserted! The
vault will be ours!

FESTER
But...

Abigail hugs Fester's head to her bosom.

ABIGAIL
Can you hear it, my treasure? My
heartbeat? It beats only for you.
Listen closely - it says, "Gordon,
I love you... Gordon, the vault..."

FESTER
I do hear it...

ABIGAIL
Soon we'll have the money, and
we'll be far from here... Loving
mother, grateful son... this is
no time for theatre...
(she gives his head
a twist and becomes
quite fierce)
Understood?

CUT TO:

82 OMITTED 82
thru thru
85 85

86 EXT. ROOF - EVENING 86

Fester stands alone on the roof, looking out over the
cemetery, brooding.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 62.

86 CONTINUED: 86

GOMEZ (O.S.)
There you are! At last!

Gomez joins Fester at the railing.

GOMEZ
What a fool I was to doubt you! Dr.
Pinder-Schloss explained everything.
What a lovely woman - so chilly.
Displacement - it's a common
psychosis. Isn't that grand?

FESTER
Is it?

Gomez slaps an arm around him.

GOMEZ
Look at it, Fester.

Beaming, Gomez gazes down into the cemetery. It is morbid
and magnificent in the moonlight. The swamp bubbles.
Patches of fog crawl. Unidentified beasties gambol.

GOMEZ
The primeval ooze. Quicksand. Fumes.
Toxic waste. It's all ours, Fester.
You belong here, old man.

FESTER
You don't know what you're asking.
You have a beautiful wife. Wonderful
kids.
(gesturing to the swamp)
A wasteland. I'm... in the way.

GOMEZ
In the way? A brother?

FESTER
Gomez, take care. For you - life
is all fun and games. A dance in
a graveyard. Stench and decay.
But... things change.

GOMEZ
Precisely - you're back! Those
years apart, Fester. We can't do
that again. You're home.

Gomez holds out his hand. Thing is there with a golf
club. Gomez passes the club to Fester. Thing supplies
Gomez with another club.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 63.

86 CONTINUED: (2) 86

The two men hit golfballs off the roof, and over the
cemetery, into the darkness. In the distance, OS, we
hear the sound of a WINDOW BREAKING.

GOMEZ
Fore!

CUT TO:

A87 OMITTED A87

87 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - LATER 87

Fester sits on the edge of his bed, brooding.

Wednesday and Pugsley appear in the doorway.

PUGSLEY
Come on, Uncle Fester. Come to
the play.

FESTER
I said I was busy!

WEDNESDAY
But you said you'd help us. With
the Shakespeare. And the pus.

FESTER
I changed my mind!

CUT TO:

88 OMITTED 88
thru thru
90 90

A91 EXT. SCHOOL - NIGHT A91

The Duesenberg pulls up in front of the school building.
By-standers eye the strange and wondrous automobile.
Lurch steps out of the car, and opens the rear door, with
great ceremony. As the by-standers gape, the Addams
family steps out of the car, as if attending the Academy
Awards.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/26/91 63A.

B91 INT. SCHOOL AUDITORIUM LOBBY - NIGHT B91

The lobby is crowed with the families of students. As the
Addamses enter, a young woman, SUSAN FIRKINS, approaches
Morticia. Susan is Wednesday's teacher; she's wholesome,
frazzled and a little too eager.

SUSAN
Mrs. Addams?

MORTICIA
Yes?

SUSAN
Could I see you for a moment? I'm
Susan Firkins, Wednesday's teacher.

MORTICIA
Oh, of course. Ms. Furkins -
Wednesday's told us so much about
you. Have you ever heard from
your husband?

CUT TO:

B91A INT. FESTER'S ROOM - SAME TIME B91A

At his desk now, Fester works with great concentrations.
He appears to be building a bomb. He looks at the clock.
He hurries.
CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In Fester's room, Abigail confronts him about the children's play, revealing her anger and ulterior motive to rob the vault. After a moment of manipulation, Fester is torn between his loyalty to his family and Abigail's selfish plans. On the roof, Gomez reassures Fester of his place in the family, but Fester still feels like a burden. The scene ends with Fester alone and troubled, as Wednesday and Pugsley urge him to join the play.
Strengths
  • Sharp dialogue
  • Complex character relationships
  • Darkly comedic tone
Weaknesses
  • Some scenes may be too dark for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines dark humor, family dynamics, and high stakes to create an engaging and entertaining narrative. The dialogue is witty and sharp, and the character interactions are intriguing.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of family loyalty, legacy, and dark humor is effectively explored in the scene, adding depth and complexity to the characters and their relationships.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and moves the story forward by introducing conflicts, character development, and high stakes. It keeps the audience invested in the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on family dynamics, combining elements of manipulation, loyalty, and dark humor in a unique and engaging way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams Family universe.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions are compelling. The scene delves into the complexities of family relationships and individual motivations, adding depth to the story.

Character Changes: 7

Fester undergoes a subtle change in perspective and loyalty throughout the scene, reflecting on his identity and family ties. This adds depth to his character arc.

Internal Goal: 8

Abigail's internal goal is to manipulate Fester into staying with her and helping her with her plan to rob the Addams Family vault. This reflects her deeper desire for power and control over Fester.

External Goal: 7

Abigail's external goal is to convince Fester not to go to the children's play so they can rob the Addams Family vault while everyone is away. This reflects the immediate challenge of securing the money from the vault.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The scene introduces conflicts related to identity, loyalty, and family dynamics, increasing tension and engaging the audience in the narrative.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Abigail's manipulative tactics challenging Fester's loyalty and sense of family duty. The audience is left unsure of how Fester will respond to her persuasion.

High Stakes: 8

The scene introduces high stakes related to family loyalty, identity, and legacy, increasing tension and engaging the audience in the narrative.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, developing character relationships, and setting up future plot points.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the shifting dynamics between characters and the unexpected twists in dialogue and actions. The audience is kept on their toes wondering how the conflict will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Abigail's manipulative and power-hungry nature and Fester's loyalty to his family. Abigail's values clash with Fester's sense of family duty and love.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from dark humor to concern and brooding introspection. It adds depth to the characters and their relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, witty, and reflective of the characters' personalities. It adds humor and depth to the scene, enhancing the overall narrative.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dramatic tension, emotional manipulation, and dark humor. The conflict between characters keeps the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of dialogue, action, and visual descriptions. The rhythm of the scene enhances the emotional impact and tension.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions enhance the atmosphere of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the tension between Fester and Abigail, showcasing their conflicting motivations. However, Abigail's abrupt shift from anger to affection feels jarring and could benefit from a smoother transition to enhance believability.
  • The dialogue is engaging and reflects the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family. However, some lines, particularly Abigail's, could be more concise to maintain the scene's pacing and avoid redundancy.
  • Fester's internal conflict is well-established, but the scene could delve deeper into his emotional turmoil. Adding more internal thoughts or visual cues could help the audience empathize with his struggle between familial loyalty and Abigail's manipulative intentions.
  • The visual elements, such as Abigail's slap followed by a hug, are striking but could be enhanced with more descriptive action lines to better convey the physicality of their relationship. This would help the audience visualize the emotional complexity of their interactions.
  • The scene ends abruptly after Fester's acceptance of Abigail's words. A more gradual build-up to his decision or a moment of hesitation could heighten the tension and make his eventual compliance feel more impactful.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Fester hesitates before agreeing to Abigail's plan, which would emphasize his internal conflict and make his eventual compliance more poignant.
  • Revise Abigail's dialogue to make her emotional shifts more gradual. For example, after slapping Fester, she could express her frustration in a more nuanced way before transitioning to affection.
  • Incorporate more physical actions or expressions from Fester to illustrate his emotional state. For instance, showing him fidgeting or looking away could enhance the audience's understanding of his discomfort.
  • Add a brief moment of silence or a pause after Abigail's hug to allow the weight of the situation to settle before moving on to the next scene. This would create a more dramatic effect.
  • Consider using a visual metaphor or symbol in the room that reflects Fester's internal struggle, such as a broken clock or a shadowy figure, to deepen the thematic elements of the scene.



Scene 33 -  Heroes and Hiccups
C91 INT. SCHOOL AUDITORIUM LOBBY - A MINUTE LATER C91

Susan Firkins is showing Morticia a bulletin board hanging
on one side of the lobby.

SUSAN
Wednesday is an excellent student, but
frankly, I'm concerned. This is our
class bulletin board. This month our
theme is "Our Heroes", people we love
and admire. You see, Susan Ringo has
chosen the President.
(she points to a magazine
cover of President Bush,
hanging next to a child's
essay)
Isn't that sweet? And Harmony Feld
has picked Diane Sawyer.
(she pints to a photo of
Diane Sawyer, hanging next
to Harmony's essay)

MORTICIA
(concerned)
Have you spoken to her parents?
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 63B.

C91 CONTINUED: C91

SUSAN
(not comprehending)
But Wednesday brought in this picture
- "Calpurnia Addams."
(she points to a photo of
an oil painting of an
evil-looking crone.

MORTICIA
(touched and very proud)
Wednesday's Great Aunt Calpurnia. She
was burned as a witch in 1706. They
say she danced naked in the town
square, and enslaved a minister.

SUSAN
(shocked)
Really?

MORTICIA
Oh, yes. But don't worry, we've told
Wednesday - college first.

ANGLE on Susan, with her mouth hanging open.

CUT TO:


91 INT. SCHOOL AUDITORIUM LOBBY - NIGHT 91

Tully and Margaret are chatting with the Addamses. The
Alford's son, TULLY JR., is wearing a felt ELF COSTUME.

MARGARET
(holding her son's
shoulders)
Isn't he adorable? I made this
myself.

MORTICIA
It's charming. What is he -- a
lizard?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 64.

91 CONTINUED: 91

MARGARET
An elf.
(she kneels and wipes
Tully Jr.'s face
with a Kleenex)
Look at you - that's better. You
are just too precious for words.
Why, I could just eat you alive!

MORTICIA
No, Margaret. Too young.

TULLY
So Gomez, um, where's Fester this
evening?

GOMEZ
Moody -- as usual. We're all out
on a jaunt, and he's home alone,
in that big empty house.

TULLY
(his eyes gleaming)
What a shame.

Granny and Lurch appear, hawking another of Granny's
"delicacies."

GRANNY
Toad on a stick! Get your red hot
toad on a stick! Can't enjoy the
show without your toad on a stick!

A92 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - SAME TIME A92

At his desk now, Fester works with great concentration.
He appears to be building a bomb. He looks at the clock.
He hurries.

CUT TO:

B92 INT. SCHOOL AUDITORIUM - SAME TIME B92

Gomez attempts to schmooze Judge Womack.

GOMEZ
I was hoping you'd come over and
play a round of golf. Not to brag
but I've got a beautiful little
nine hole pitch-and-putt-set up in
my cemetery.

JUDGE WOMACK
I'd rather rot in hell.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 65.

B92 CONTINUED: B92

GOMEZ
Ahhh... a previous engagement.

He tucks one of his cigars in Judge Womack's breast pocket
and heads off to join his family.

CUT TO:

C92 OMITTED C92
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the school auditorium lobby, Susan Firkins voices her concerns to Morticia about Wednesday's unconventional choice of her Great Aunt Calpurnia as a hero for the class bulletin board. Morticia defends Wednesday's decision with pride, while Tully and Margaret engage with the Addams family, showcasing Tully Jr. in an elf costume. Granny makes a quirky appearance selling 'toad on a stick,' and Fester is seen building a bomb in his room. The scene concludes with Gomez's awkward attempts to socialize with Judge Womack, who dismisses him, highlighting the darkly comedic tone of the interactions.
Strengths
  • Unique humor and tone
  • Strong character development
  • Effective dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Low emotional impact
  • Limited character changes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, character development, and plot progression to showcase the Addams family's eccentricities and values.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring the Addams family's legacy in a school setting is innovative and engaging, providing insight into their values and beliefs.

Plot: 8

The plot progresses smoothly, introducing conflicts and showcasing the Addams family's interactions with other characters in a school environment.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the theme of heroism by showcasing unconventional choices and challenging societal norms. The authenticity of characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with distinct personalities and speaking styles that contribute to the humor and tone of the scene.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it further establishes the unique personalities and values of the Addams family members.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal is to ensure that Wednesday's unique choice of hero, Great Aunt Calpurnia, is understood and respected by the school community.

External Goal: 7

Morticia's external goal is to navigate the social expectations and reactions to Wednesday's unconventional choice of hero for the class bulletin board.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, primarily stemming from the clash of values between the Addams family and other characters.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene, represented by societal expectations and reactions, adds a layer of conflict and uncertainty to the characters' interactions.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and character dynamics than intense conflict or drama.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing conflicts and showcasing the Addams family's interactions in a school setting.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in its character interactions and unconventional choices, adding an element of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around societal norms and individuality. Morticia's acceptance of Wednesday's unconventional hero choice challenges the traditional views of heroism held by the school community.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a mix of emotions, including pride, concern, and shock, but focuses more on humor and satire.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, reflecting the unique personalities of the Addams family members and their interactions with other characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of humor, conflict, and character dynamics, keeping the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, maintaining a steady rhythm that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively conveys the interactions and conflicts between characters in a school setting.


Critique
  • The scene effectively contrasts the Addams family's dark humor with the more conventional values represented by Susan and Margaret. This juxtaposition highlights the absurdity of the Addams family's perspective, particularly Morticia's pride in her ancestor's witchcraft. However, the dialogue could benefit from more punchy lines that emphasize the humor and eccentricity of the Addams family.
  • Morticia's character shines through her pride in Wednesday's choice, but the scene could delve deeper into her emotional connection to her family's history. Adding a line or two that reflects Morticia's personal feelings about Calpurnia could enhance her character development and provide a richer emotional layer.
  • The transition between the two settings (the school auditorium and Fester's room) feels abrupt. While it serves to build tension, a smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the narrative. Consider adding a brief moment that connects the two scenes thematically or visually.
  • Tully's character is introduced with a hint of malice, but his motivations remain unclear. Providing a more explicit indication of his intentions regarding Fester could heighten the tension and intrigue. This would also create a stronger connection between the two scenes, as Tully's curiosity about Fester's whereabouts could foreshadow future conflict.
  • Granny's line about 'toad on a stick' adds a humorous touch, but it feels somewhat disconnected from the main conversation. Integrating her character more seamlessly into the dialogue or giving her a more relevant line could enhance the comedic effect and maintain the scene's focus.
Suggestions
  • Revise Morticia's dialogue to include a more personal reflection on Calpurnia, perhaps expressing how her legacy influences her parenting style or her own identity.
  • Consider adding a brief moment of interaction between Susan and Morticia that highlights their differing values, perhaps through a humorous misunderstanding or a witty exchange.
  • Create a smoother transition between the school auditorium and Fester's room by incorporating a visual or thematic link, such as a sound effect or a shared motif that connects the two scenes.
  • Clarify Tully's motivations by adding a line that hints at his ulterior motives regarding Fester, which would build suspense and create a stronger narrative thread.
  • Integrate Granny's character more effectively into the scene by giving her a line that ties into the main conversation or enhances the humor, ensuring that her presence feels purposeful.



Scene 34 -  A Performance of Contrasts
92 INT. VARIETY SHOW STAGE - LATER 92

A HALF DOZEN ADORABLE SEVEN YEAR OLDS are on stage
singing "We Are The World." They finish to the enthusi-
astic applause of the AUDITORIUM FULL OF PARENTS.

Morticia and Gomez politely join in while Lurch fidgets
and Granny slumps, bored, in her chair.

MORTICIA
The children are next.

Lurch stops fidgeting and Granny sits up straight.

CUT TO:

A93 INT. BACKSTAGE - SAME TIME A93

Sitting at the make-up mirror, Wednesday and Pugsley
are putting on their armor. Fester is suddenly behind
them, reflected in the mirror.

FESTER
I changed my mind.

He thrusts a package toward them.

CUT TO:

B93 EXT. ADDAMS HOUSE - SAME TIME B93

Abigail is hammering on the door with the knocker.

ABIGAIL
(whispering, sweetly)
Gordon... Gordon... it's Mother...
(very harsh, banging
the knocker)
Dammit, where are you! I should
never have used him!

She clomps down the porch steps and heads around the side
of the house, peering in windows.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 66.

C93 INT. AUDITORIUM. SAME TIME. C93

Pushing people aside, Fester forces his way to where his
family is seated. They're happy to see him.

GOMEZ
(whispers)
I knew you couldn't stay away,
old man.

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D93 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION. SAME TIME. D93

Standing on tiptoes, Virginia tries yet another window.

AT HER ANKLES --

VINES snake out from a window well. They wrap firmly
around her ankles.

She gapes down at them and screams. There's no one to
hear her and no escape.

The vines go taut, preparing to pull her under.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary On a lively variety show stage, a group of seven-year-olds performs 'We Are The World,' delighting the audience while Morticia and Gomez cheer them on. Backstage, Wednesday and Pugsley prepare for their act, and Fester surprises them with a package after a change of heart. Outside, Abigail expresses frustration over Gordon's absence, while Virginia finds herself in a dangerous situation as vines ensnare her ankles. The scene juxtaposes the lighthearted performance with the tension of Virginia's peril, culminating in her panicked scream as the vines tighten.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Effective blend of humor and suspense
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be predictable
  • Limited external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, suspense, and character dynamics, keeping the audience engaged and intrigued.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family dynamics, dark humor, and supernatural elements is well-developed and adds depth to the scene.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses effectively, introducing new elements and conflicts while maintaining the overall tone and themes of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on family dynamics and societal norms, with unique characters and unexpected plot developments.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, each with their own unique traits and dynamics that contribute to the overall scene. Their interactions are engaging and add depth to the story.

Character Changes: 7

There are subtle changes in some characters, particularly Fester, as he grapples with his identity and loyalty to the family.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to maintain their family dynamic and protect their loved ones from external threats.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to reunite with their family members and ensure their safety.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

There is a moderate level of conflict present, primarily in the form of internal family dynamics, secrets, and underlying tensions.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene adds a layer of suspense and uncertainty, keeping the audience engaged in the characters' struggles.

High Stakes: 7

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, there is a sense of tension and mystery that keeps the audience invested in the characters' fates.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up future events.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and plot twists that keep the audience on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the clash between societal norms and the unconventional behavior of the Addams Family. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs in family loyalty and acceptance of individuality.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from amusement to concern, keeping the audience emotionally engaged.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reveals insights into the characters' personalities and relationships. It adds to the overall tone and atmosphere of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mix of humor, suspense, and character dynamics that keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of tension with humor and character interactions.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear descriptions and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions between different locations and characters.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the contrast between the innocent performance of the children and the dark undertones of the Addams family, particularly with Fester's sudden appearance and the ominous subplot involving Abigail. However, the transition between the cheerful atmosphere of the variety show and the sinister elements could be more pronounced to enhance the comedic horror tone that the Addams Family is known for.
  • Fester's line, 'I changed my mind,' is intriguing but lacks context. It would benefit from a brief explanation or a hint at what he changed his mind about, which could add depth to his character and create anticipation for the audience.
  • The pacing of the scene feels a bit rushed, especially with the quick cuts between the auditorium, backstage, and outside the Addams house. While quick cuts can create a sense of urgency, they can also disorient the audience if not executed carefully. A more gradual transition or a clearer thematic connection between the locations could enhance coherence.
  • Abigail's character is introduced with a strong sense of urgency and frustration, but her motivations remain somewhat unclear. Providing a line or two that hints at her intentions could make her character more compelling and create a stronger sense of tension.
  • The visual imagery of vines wrapping around Virginia's ankles is effective in creating suspense, but it could be enhanced with more descriptive language to evoke a stronger emotional response from the audience. Additionally, the connection between Virginia's predicament and the Addams family's antics could be more explicitly drawn to heighten the stakes.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two from Fester that hints at what he changed his mind about, which could create intrigue and set up a more engaging payoff later in the story.
  • Enhance the transitions between scenes by using thematic elements or visual motifs that connect the cheerful performance with the darker elements of the Addams family, reinforcing the contrast.
  • Expand on Abigail's motivations by including a line that reveals her frustration with Gordon or her plans, which would add depth to her character and increase tension.
  • Use more descriptive language to enhance the visual imagery of Virginia's predicament, making it more vivid and engaging for the audience.
  • Consider slowing down the pacing slightly to allow the audience to absorb the humor and tension in each location before moving on to the next, ensuring that the comedic and horror elements land effectively.



Scene 35 -  A Bloody Performance
93 INT. VARIETY SHOW STAGE. A SHORT WHILE LATER. 93

Pugsley and Wednesday in their elaborate costumes are
drawing to the climax of their scene from "Hamlet." As
they duel, they act their little Addams' hearts out.

WEDNESDAY
How all occasions do inform against me,
and spur my dull revenge! O, from this
time forth, my thoughts be bloody or be
nothing worth! If I must strike you
dead, I will!

Pugsley lands the first blow, slashing Wednesday's arm.
HER SLEEVE RENDS AND BLOOD SPURTS.

PUGSLEY
A hit, a very palpable hit.

They both press the attack, drawing blood. In a fatal
blow, Pugsley SLASHES WEDNESDAY'S JUGULAR. She makes
horrible GURGLING NOISES. BLOOD SPURTS in arterial
squirts.

WEDNESDAY
O proud death! What feast is
toward in thine eternal cell?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 66A.

93 CONTINUED: 93

In a final vengeful moment, Wednesday HACKS AT PUGSLEY'S
LEFT ARM, CUTTING IT OFF, SENDING A GUSHER OF BLOOD OUT
OF HIS STUMP. THE ARM DROPS TO THE STAGE AND BOUNCES OFF,
LANDING IN JUDGE WOMACK'S LAP.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 67.

93 CONTINUED: 93

ONSTAGE --

Wednesday clutches her bleeding throat.

WEDNESDAY
(gurgles)
Sweet oblivion, open your arms.

Wednesday falls dead.

THE AUDIENCE --

sits perfectly still, jaws agape, deep in shock. An oil
painting. Then...

THE ADDAMS FAMILY --

leaps as one to their feet, applauding wildly.

GOMEZ
Bravo!

THE LIGHTS ON STAGE COME UP --

and Pugsley and Wednesday bow deeply, accepting their
family's applause.

Fester applauds louder than anybody.

CUT TO:

94 OMITTED 94
and and
A95 A95

B95 INT. WEDNESDAY'S BEDROOM - LATER THAT NIGHT B95

Fester is tucking Wednesday into bed. They are now
devoted friends.

FESTER
...there were sailors and pirates,
and an airplane full of tourists
from Miami Beach. All lost in the
triangle.

WEDNESDAY
(thrilled)
Uncle Fester, someday will you take
me there?

FESTER
It's a promise. Goodnight,
Wednesday. You were terrific.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 67A.

B95 CONTINUED: B95

He kisses her on her forehead. She holds out her headless
doll. Fester kisses the doll's empty neck. Wednesday
holds out the doll's severed head. Fester kisses it.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary Pugsley and Wednesday take the stage in a dramatic rendition of 'Hamlet,' where their duel escalates into a violent spectacle. Wednesday passionately recites lines about revenge while Pugsley inflicts serious injuries, culminating in him slashing her jugular. In a shocking twist, Wednesday retaliates by severing Pugsley's arm, leading to a graphic display of blood that stuns the audience before they erupt into applause. The Addams family celebrates their children's performance, and later, Fester shares a tender moment with Wednesday as he tucks her into bed, bonding over a story of lost sailors.
Strengths
  • Dark humor
  • Unique performance
  • Character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Minimal character development
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams family with its dark humor and playful tone. It showcases the characters' eccentricities and adds depth to their personalities.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, featuring a darkly humorous performance by Pugsley and Wednesday, aligns well with the overall theme of the Addams family and adds depth to their characters.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the performance by Pugsley and Wednesday, adding entertainment value and showcasing the family's unique dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the classic play 'Hamlet' by incorporating the Addams Family characters and their darkly comedic interpretation. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric personalities, adding depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in the scene, as it mainly focuses on showcasing the characters' existing personalities and dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

Wednesday's internal goal in this scene is to embody the character of Ophelia from 'Hamlet' and deliver a dramatic performance. This reflects her desire for self-expression and her fascination with dark themes.

External Goal: 7

The external goal is to impress the audience with their performance and receive applause. This reflects their desire for recognition and validation.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild conflict in the scene during the performance, adding tension and humor to the situation.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing physical and emotional challenges during their performance, creating uncertainty and tension.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in the scene, focusing more on entertainment and character development rather than high-stakes drama.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by adding depth to the characters and highlighting the family's unconventional nature, contributing to the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 9

This scene is unpredictable because of the sudden and violent actions of the characters, keeping the audience on edge.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the juxtaposition of life and death, as the characters enact a violent and fatal scene from a play. This challenges the audience's perception of morality and entertainment.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene evokes a mix of amusement and dark humor, engaging the audience emotionally through its unique and entertaining performance.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, darkly humorous, and in line with the Addams family's unique style, adding to the overall entertainment value of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its shocking and unexpected twists, dark humor, and dramatic tension.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene adds to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense during the performance, leading to a shocking and memorable conclusion.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the standard screenplay format for a performance scene, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a performance scene in a screenplay, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, showcasing the children’s theatricality and their penchant for violence. However, the extreme nature of the violence may alienate some viewers, as it pushes the boundaries of comedic shock value. The juxtaposition of the children's innocent performance with graphic violence is a hallmark of the Addams Family, but it should be balanced to maintain audience engagement without overwhelming them.
  • The dialogue is well-chosen, with Wednesday's lines echoing the themes of revenge and mortality from 'Hamlet.' However, the transition from the dramatic lines to the violent actions could be smoother. The abruptness of the violence following the poetic dialogue may disrupt the flow and emotional impact of the scene.
  • The audience's reaction is a strong comedic element, but it could be enhanced by showing a wider range of responses from the audience. While the Addams Family's enthusiastic applause is fitting, including shocked or horrified reactions from other audience members could amplify the absurdity of the situation.
  • The visual descriptions of blood and injury are vivid, but they may benefit from a touch of restraint. The graphic nature of the violence could be toned down slightly to maintain the comedic tone without veering into horror. This would allow the humor to shine through more clearly.
  • The relationship between Fester and Wednesday is sweetly developed in the following scene, but the transition from the violent performance to their bonding moment feels abrupt. A brief moment of reflection or a humorous comment from Fester about the performance could create a smoother transition and enhance the emotional connection.
Suggestions
  • Consider softening the graphic violence slightly to maintain a comedic tone while still delivering shock value. This could involve suggesting the violence rather than depicting it in graphic detail.
  • Enhance the audience's reaction by including a mix of shock, horror, and laughter from different audience members, creating a more dynamic atmosphere.
  • Add a brief moment of reflection or humor from Fester after the performance to create a smoother transition to the bonding scene with Wednesday, reinforcing their relationship.
  • Ensure that the dialogue flows naturally into the action. Perhaps include a line from Wednesday that leads directly into the violence, making it feel more intentional and less abrupt.
  • Consider using visual gags or props that play into the absurdity of the scene, such as exaggerated blood effects or humorous costumes, to maintain the lightheartedness of the Addams Family's dark humor.



Scene 36 -  Eternal Embrace in the Moonlight
C95 INT. CEMETERY - SAME TIME C95

Morticia is standing in the moonlight. Gomez sits on a
bench nearby.

MORTICIA
What a sublime evening. A
theatrical triumph...

GOMEZ
A Shakespearean delight! All hail Fester!

MORTICIA
It's like a dream. When we first met,
years ago, it was an evening much like
this. Magic in the air. A boy...

GOMEZ
A girl...

MORTICIA
(nostalgically
sitting beside Gomez)
An open grave... It was my first
funeral.

GOMEZ
You were so beautiful - pale, and
mysterious. No one even looked at
the corpse.

MORTICIA
Your cousin, Balthazar. You were
still a suspect. I couldn't stop
staring, all during the eulogy. Your
eyes. Your moustache. Your laugh.

GOMEZ
(aglow with romance)
You bewitched me. I proposed that
very night.

MORTICIA
(gazing at the cemetery)
Just think - someday we'll be buried
here. Side by side, six feet under.
In matching coffins. Our lifeless
bodies, rotting together, for all
eternity.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 67B.

C95 CONTINUED: C95

GOMEZ
(aroused by all this)
Cara mia!

MORTICIA
(passionately)
Mon sauvage!

They embrace in the moonlight. As they do, the camera
PANS above their heads: we see the headstone featuring
UNCLE FESTER.

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95 INT. CONSERVATORY - MORNING 95

LURCH --

is sweeping up. Among the plants, he comes upon

ABIGAIL -- tightly wrapped in a plant cocoon.

Lurch growls.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/18/90 68.
Genres: ["Dark Comedy","Family","Horror"]

Summary In a moonlit cemetery, Morticia and Gomez share a romantic moment, reminiscing about their first meeting at a funeral. They express their love and fantasize about being buried together in matching coffins, deepening their bond with dark humor. The scene culminates in a passionate embrace, with Uncle Fester's headstone subtly highlighted, symbolizing their unique affection and eternal connection.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Unique blend of romance and dark humor
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, romance, and dark themes, providing insight into the Addams family dynamics and values.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of blending romance, nostalgia, and dark humor within the context of the Addams family's unique worldview is engaging and well-realized.

Plot: 7

While the plot does not advance significantly in this scene, it provides important character development and thematic exploration.

Originality: 9

The scene is highly original in its portrayal of love and romance within a gothic and macabre setting. The characters' dialogue and actions are authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The scene deepens our understanding of Morticia and Gomez's relationship and the Addams family dynamics, showcasing their quirks, values, and dark humor.

Character Changes: 7

While there is not significant character change in this scene, it deepens our understanding of Morticia and Gomez's relationship and the Addams family dynamics.

Internal Goal: 9

Morticia's internal goal in this scene is to reminisce about her past with Gomez and express her deep connection and love for him. This reflects her desire for a romantic and eternal bond with Gomez.

External Goal: 7

The external goal of the protagonist in this scene is not clearly defined, but it could be to enjoy the moment and express their love for each other in a unique and gothic way.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is some tension and conflict in the scene, particularly in Morticia and Gomez's past and the family's dark legacy, it is not the primary focus.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is minimal, as the focus is on the romantic interaction between Morticia and Gomez rather than external conflicts.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on character dynamics and thematic exploration than high-stakes conflict.

Story Forward: 6

The scene provides important character development and thematic exploration but does not significantly advance the main plot.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected romantic and morbid elements that are intertwined in the dialogue and actions of the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams Family's unconventional views on love, death, and eternity. Morticia and Gomez's romantic dialogue challenges traditional notions of romance and mortality.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from nostalgia and romance to dark humor and amusement, engaging the audience on multiple levels.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, engaging, and reveals insights into the characters' personalities and relationships.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its unique setting, dark humor, and romantic dialogue between the characters. The audience is drawn into the unconventional love story of Morticia and Gomez.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and emotion between Morticia and Gomez, leading to a climactic moment of embrace.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a gothic romance genre, with a focus on dialogue and character interaction.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly romantic tone characteristic of the Addams Family, showcasing Morticia and Gomez's unique relationship. Their dialogue is witty and filled with playful banter, which is a hallmark of their dynamic. However, the references to death and decay, while fitting for the characters, may come off as overly morbid for some audiences. Balancing the humor with the macabre could enhance the scene's appeal.
  • The nostalgic recollection of their first meeting at a funeral is a clever way to highlight their bond, but it could benefit from more vivid imagery or sensory details to immerse the audience further. Describing the atmosphere, sounds, or even the scents of the cemetery could enhance the scene's mood and make it more evocative.
  • The transition from their romantic moment to the reveal of Uncle Fester's headstone is effective in maintaining the dark humor of the Addams Family. However, the cut to the conservatory feels abrupt. A smoother transition or a brief moment of reflection from Morticia and Gomez before cutting away could provide a more cohesive flow.
  • While the dialogue is engaging, it occasionally leans heavily on exposition. The audience is informed about their past rather than shown it. Incorporating flashbacks or visual storytelling elements could make their history feel more immediate and impactful.
  • The scene's pacing is generally good, but the emotional beats could be enhanced by allowing moments of silence or stillness after key lines. For instance, after Morticia's line about being buried together, a pause could emphasize the weight of that sentiment before they embrace.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more sensory details to the setting to create a richer atmosphere. Describe the sounds of the night, the chill in the air, or the scent of the earth to draw the audience into the moment.
  • Explore the use of flashbacks or visual cues to illustrate their memories instead of relying solely on dialogue. This could deepen the audience's connection to their past.
  • Introduce a brief moment of silence or stillness after significant lines to allow the weight of the dialogue to resonate with the audience before moving on.
  • To enhance the humor, consider adding a quirky element to the cemetery setting, such as unusual gravestones or a humorous interaction with a passing character, to maintain the Addams Family's signature blend of dark comedy.
  • Ensure that the transition to the next scene feels more fluid. Perhaps include a line or action that ties Morticia and Gomez's moment to the following scene, creating a thematic link.



Scene 37 -  A Farewell Breakfast
A96 INT. KITCHEN - LATER A96

The cheerful Addams breakfast is underway. Fester is at
the table with the family.

PUGSLEY
(to Fester)
Did you like the blood?

FESTER
Perfect - a full bucket. I was so
proud.

MORTICIA
Weren't we all. Wednesday, play
with your food.

Wednesday has SOMETHING MOVING in her cereal bowl. She
teases it with her fork.

Granny SCREAMS, at the sideboard.

MORTICIA
Mama?

Granny pulls a SKELETON OF A SHIN AND FOOT out of one of
the serving dishes.

GRANNY
Who put this in here?

Pugsley and Fester exchange a conspiratorial glance and
giggle.

GRANNY
(referring to the
skeleton)
That's for company!

GOMEZ
(shaking his head,
amused)
Rascals.

Abigail enters, peeling off bits of the vines that had
encased her.

GOMEZ
Doctor! You were so right! What
an evening!

MORTICIA
Fester fit right in.

GOMEZ
The displacement is over!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/14/90 69.

A96 CONTINUED: A96

ABIGAIL
(glaring at Fester)
Vell, isn't zat... nice.

WEDNESDAY
Does he really have to go.

ABIGAIL
Jais, he does.

GOMEZ
Well, if he insists upon leaving, we
shall mark the occasion. Tish?

MORTICIA
(to Fester)
We've planned a farewell party.

GOMEZ
We've invited the whole clan.

Amazed by the gesture, Fester looks over at Gomez and
Morticia.

ABIGAIL
Vat a luffly gesture.

MORTICIA
(gazing at her family)
Bloodshed... anguish... breakfast...
We're a family again. And we owe
it all to you, Dr. Pinder-Schloss.

ABIGAIL
Please - Greta.

MORTICIA
Greta.

ABIGAIL
Fester - valk me out.

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Genres: ["Dark Comedy","Family","Horror"]

Summary The Addams family gathers for a whimsical breakfast filled with dark humor, as Fester proudly shares his love for blood and the family discovers a skeleton in the serving dishes, eliciting giggles. Wednesday teases her cereal, while Morticia expresses gratitude for their reunion and plans a farewell party for Fester, who is set to leave. Abigail, recently freed from vines, joins the family, adding a mix of authority and acceptance to the quirky atmosphere. The scene captures the family's eccentric charm and affection amidst the bittersweet occasion.
Strengths
  • Dark humor
  • Family dynamics
  • Character interactions
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, dark themes, and character dynamics, creating an engaging and entertaining moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a macabre family breakfast with dark humor and themes of displacement is well-executed and adds depth to the overall story.

Plot: 7

While the plot doesn't significantly advance in this scene, it adds depth to the characters and showcases their relationships and dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its unique blend of dark humor, macabre elements, and eccentric character dynamics. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions add layers to their personalities, especially highlighting the unconventional nature of the Addams family.

Character Changes: 6

While there isn't significant character change in this scene, it does showcase the family's acceptance of Fester and their bond.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to maintain the unity and happiness of the Addams family. Morticia expresses gratitude towards Dr. Pinder-Schloss for bringing the family back together, reflecting her deeper desire for a strong and loving family bond.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to plan a farewell party for Fester. This goal reflects the immediate circumstances of Fester's departure and the need to mark the occasion with a celebration.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there is some conflict in terms of Fester's departure, the scene focuses more on humor and family dynamics.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Abigail's disapproval of Fester serving as a minor obstacle to the Addams family's plans. The uncertainty of Fester's departure adds a layer of tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and family dynamics than intense conflict.

Story Forward: 6

The scene doesn't move the main plot forward significantly but adds depth to the characters and their relationships.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the Addams family's interactions and reactions. The audience is kept on their toes by the eccentric and unconventional behavior of the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the acceptance of Fester as part of the Addams family. Abigail's disapproval of Fester's presence challenges the Addams family's values of inclusivity and acceptance of their eccentricities.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including amusement, affection, and a hint of darkness, adding depth to the characters and their relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the dark humor and family dynamics, adding depth to the scene and the characters' relationships.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dark humor, quirky characters, and witty dialogue. The interactions between the Addams family members and the comedic moments keep the audience entertained and invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions. The rhythm of the scene contributes to its comedic and engaging tone.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character dialogue, and action descriptions. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedic family interaction, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, showcasing their unique blend of macabre humor and familial warmth. The dialogue flows naturally, with each character's personality shining through, particularly Fester's enthusiasm for blood and Granny's shock at the skeleton.
  • The use of physical comedy, such as Granny pulling out the skeleton and the children's conspiratorial giggles, adds a visual element that enhances the humor. However, the scene could benefit from a stronger visual description to paint a clearer picture of the kitchen setting and the characters' actions.
  • The introduction of Abigail adds tension, but her character feels somewhat underdeveloped in this scene. Her glaring at Fester and the abruptness of her entrance could be expanded to provide more context about her relationship with the Addams family and her motivations.
  • The farewell party concept is a nice touch, but it could be more impactful if the characters expressed their feelings about Fester's departure more explicitly. This would deepen the emotional stakes and provide a contrast to the humor, making the scene more resonant.
  • The transition to the next scene feels a bit abrupt. A more gradual shift or a closing line that ties back to the breakfast theme could create a smoother flow.
Suggestions
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the kitchen and the characters' actions to create a more vivid setting. For example, describe the breakfast spread or the expressions on the characters' faces as they interact.
  • Develop Abigail's character further by adding a line or two that hints at her feelings towards the Addams family or her past experiences with them. This could create a more dynamic interaction between her and Fester.
  • Incorporate more emotional dialogue regarding Fester's departure. Perhaps have Morticia or Gomez express their feelings about losing him, which would add depth to the scene.
  • Consider adding a humorous or poignant closing line that reflects the Addams family's unique perspective on farewells, creating a more cohesive transition to the next scene.
  • Explore the potential for more physical comedy or visual gags throughout the scene, as this is a hallmark of the Addams Family's charm and could enhance the overall comedic effect.



Scene 38 -  A Dance of Deception and Affection
96 EXT. FRONT WALK - A LITTLE LATER. 96

Fester is escorting Abigail through the yard.

FESTER
I'm fine, Mother. I'm completely
in control.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 69A.

96 CONTINUED: 96

ABIGAIL
(grabbing him)
They're not your family, Gordon.
I am. They don't love you. I do.
They're evil and corrupt and
degraded. I can give you that.

FESTER
I'm fine. Really.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/13/91 70.

96 CONTINUED: 96

ABIGAIL
We'll see.

They reach Gate.

ABIGAIL
(bellowing)
Open up.

Even Gate is intimidated and swings open.

CUT TO:

97 INT. MORTICIA'S CONSERVATORY - EVENING. 97

Fester is cutting the blooms off Morticia's roses.

MORTICIA
We're opening the ballroom now.

Fester hesitates, then follows Morticia.

CUT TO:

98 INT. HALLWAY OUTSIDE BALLROOM - A SHORT TIME LATER 98

Each carrying a lighted candelabra, Morticia, Gomez,
Fester, Granny, Lurch, Pugsley, and Wednesday stand in
front of the tall, elaborately carved, oaken double
doors. Gomez unlatches them. Together they push them
open and STEP into the

BALLROOM

Moonlight streams in through the floor-to-ceiling windows,
revealing the true enormity of the ballroom.

It's straight out of a ROCOCO palace. A lofty unsupported
dome ceiling is DECORATED with figures worthy of Dante.
The black marble floor glistens. The furniture and banquet
tables are FUNEREALLY SHROUDED. Like some primeval sea,
the shrouds undulate in the breeze admitted through the
open doors.

Gomez steps up to Morticia and embraces her. They begin
to dance.

Fester remains frozen in the center of the ballroom,
overwhelmed by the grandeur.

FESTER
A party... for me... here...

As Gomez and Morticia waltz past...
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 71.

98 CONTINUED: 98
MORTICIA
All for you!

GOMEZ
Tish - how long has it been since
we've waltzed?

MORTICIA
(ruefully)
Oh, Gomez... hours.

He dips Morticia. As she bends back, she reaches for one of
the shrouds and WHIPS IT OFF -- IT FILLS THE SCREEN. BLACK.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary Fester is led by Abigail through the yard, where she attempts to manipulate him into believing his family doesn't love him. Despite her efforts, Fester remains steadfast in his loyalty. They arrive at a gate that Abigail commands to open, showcasing her power. The scene shifts to Morticia's conservatory, where Fester cuts roses before entering the opulent ballroom, overwhelmed by the grandeur of a party thrown in his honor. As Gomez and Morticia share a romantic dance, Fester grapples with his conflicting feelings, caught between Abigail's manipulation and the warmth of his family's love.
Strengths
  • Effective blend of dark humor and romance
  • Well-defined characters and relationships
  • Engaging dialogue and interactions
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant character development or high stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-crafted, blending dark humor, romance, and grandeur effectively. It captures the essence of the Addams family while showcasing character dynamics and relationships.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of celebrating Fester in a grand ballroom setting while exploring the romantic connection between Morticia and Gomez is engaging and well-developed.

Plot: 8

The plot progression in the scene focuses on celebrating Fester, showcasing character relationships, and adding depth to the Addams family dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh dynamics within the Addams Family, exploring themes of loyalty, manipulation, and self-discovery in a unique and engaging way. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-defined, with Morticia, Gomez, Fester, Granny, Lurch, Pugsley, and Wednesday each contributing to the scene's dynamics and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 7

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the interactions and dynamics between characters deepen, showcasing their relationships and personalities.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to assert his independence and control over his own decisions, despite Abigail's manipulative attempts to sway him. This reflects his need for autonomy and self-assurance.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to navigate the complex dynamics within the Addams Family and maintain his relationships with them, especially in the face of outside influence like Abigail's.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are tensions and conflicts hinted at in the scene, such as Abigail's manipulation of Fester and the underlying dark humor, the overall tone is more celebratory and romantic.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Abigail's manipulative tactics challenging Fester's sense of identity and loyalty. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome of their conflict.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes in the scene are not particularly high, focusing more on celebration, romance, and character dynamics.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by adding depth to the Addams family dynamics, exploring relationships, and setting up future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the shifting power dynamics and emotional revelations between characters. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the conflicts will resolve.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the contrasting values of family loyalty and individual freedom. Abigail represents a more conventional view of family, while the Addams Family embodies a unique and unconventional approach to relationships.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes emotions of love, affection, and dark humor, engaging the audience in the Addams family's unique dynamics and relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys humor, romance, and dark undertones, adding depth to the character interactions and relationships.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dramatic conflict, emotional depth, and dynamic character interactions. The tension between characters keeps the audience invested in the unfolding drama.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, balancing moments of tension, emotion, and revelation to maintain the audience's interest. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences enhances the scene's effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. It is easy to follow and visually engaging.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure, transitioning smoothly between different locations and character interactions. It maintains a cohesive narrative flow and builds tension effectively.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the tension between Fester and Abigail, showcasing her manipulative nature and Fester's struggle for autonomy. However, the dialogue could be more dynamic; it feels somewhat repetitive with Fester insisting he's 'fine' without providing deeper emotional insight into his character's conflict.
  • Abigail's characterization as the controlling mother is clear, but her motivations could be more fleshed out. Why does she believe the Addams family is evil? Adding a line or two that hints at her past experiences with them could enhance her character and make her threats feel more substantial.
  • The transition from the outdoor scene to the ballroom is visually striking, but the pacing feels abrupt. The shift from Abigail's intimidation to the grandeur of the ballroom could benefit from a more gradual build-up, perhaps by including Fester's internal thoughts or feelings about the party as they walk.
  • The description of the ballroom is vivid and aligns well with the Addams family's aesthetic. However, the emotional impact of this setting on Fester could be explored further. His reaction to the grandeur feels somewhat muted; a more visceral response could heighten the moment.
  • The dialogue between Morticia and Gomez is charming and adds a light-hearted touch, but it could be more integrated with Fester's emotional journey. Consider having Fester react to their affection in a way that highlights his feelings of being an outsider, which would deepen the emotional stakes.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two from Abigail that reveals her backstory or her reasons for wanting to separate Fester from the Addams family, which would add depth to her character.
  • Enhance Fester's internal conflict by including his thoughts or feelings as he walks with Abigail and approaches the ballroom. This could help the audience connect with his emotional state.
  • Slow down the transition to the ballroom by incorporating a moment where Fester hesitates or expresses doubt about the party, allowing for a more gradual emotional build-up.
  • Explore Fester's reaction to the ballroom's grandeur more deeply. Perhaps he could express a mix of awe and fear, emphasizing his feelings of being overwhelmed and out of place.
  • Integrate Fester's perspective into the dialogue between Morticia and Gomez, perhaps by having him comment on their affection or express a longing for that kind of connection, which would enhance the emotional resonance of the scene.



Scene 39 -  A Night of Eccentric Elegance
99 INT. THE BALLROOM. 99

When the shroud comes down THE PARTY IS IN FULL SWING.

Gomez and Morticia, resplendent now in their party
clothes, Morticia in a formal version of her black
sheath, and Gomez in black velvet lounging pajamas,
smoking jacket and fez.

A SMALL ORCHESTRA plays a FRACTURED WALTZ. Thing is a
third hand on the bass.

Gomez and Morticia dance among the ADDAMS FAMILY RELA-
TIVES -- that portrait gallery of GROTESQUES come to
life. Among them are:

DEXTER AND DONALD ADDAMS, the two-headed cousin in
matching turtlenecks.

COUSIN OPHELIA ADDAMS who looks like a Tennessee Williams
heroine who's just been fished out of the Mississippi.

SLOSH ADDAMS. If a man could look like a toad and
still be a man, this is he. He's made many a killing
on Wall Street. With him is his child-sized wife, LOIS.

DIGIT ADDAMS, all four arms embrace his date, an over-age
Heidi, with thick blonde braids.

COUSIN LUMPY ADDAMS, a teenage hunchback in a loud
blazer.

Dexter and Donald dance Ophelia over to Gomez and
Morticia.
DEXTER AND DONALD
(they echo one
another)
I wonder-- I wonder-- what
happened-- what happened-- to
Fester-- to Fester.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 72.

99 CONTINUED: 99

GOMEZ
Still primping, I suppose.

Her mind water-logged and bleary, Ophelia addresses
Morticia, with a spacy Thorazine smile.

OPHELIA
Where is Fester?

MORTICIA
Soon, Ophelia. Soon.

OPHELIA
Where am I?

CUT TO:

A100 INT. FESTER'S BEDROOM A100

Fester is in his robe, or his underwear; he is consider-
ing various pieces of clothing, on hangers or placed
on the bed. Abigail stands nearby, her arms folded.

FESTER
What would look best? A tuxedo?

ABIGAIL
A nice dark suit is perfectly
acceptable.

FESTER
But the whole family's coming!
I want to look terrific!

ABIGAIL
Gordon, may I remind you - you're
not really an Addams.

FESTER
I know, I know - but the party's
for me!
(he holds an outfit
up in front of the
mirror)
I love this.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 72A.

100 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION 100

The front door opens, and Lurch appears; he has obviously
been summoned. He looks out; his face lights up as he
sees a new arrival.

ANGLE on COUSIN IT, driving up in his bubble-topped It-
mobile. He parks the car and flips open the top. Cousin
It is a hairball in a homburg, who gleeps and squeaks in
a language the Addams have no trouble understanding. He
pauses for a moment, to survey the house.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a lively ballroom, the Addams Family hosts a whimsical party filled with eccentric relatives. Gomez and Morticia dance gracefully while their quirky family members, including two-headed cousins Dexter and Donald, express concern over Fester's absence. Meanwhile, Fester, in his bedroom, seeks advice from Abigail on his outfit, yearning to impress despite being reminded he isn't a true Addams. The scene captures the humorous and chaotic essence of the family gathering, culminating in Cousin It's unique arrival at the mansion.
Strengths
  • Eccentric characters
  • Dark humor
  • Unique setting
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams family with its dark humor, eccentric characters, and surreal setting. The party atmosphere adds a layer of intrigue and entertainment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a grand ballroom party for the Addams family, complete with eccentric relatives and dark humor, is engaging and aligns well with the overall theme of the Addams family.

Plot: 7

While the scene doesn't have a traditional plot progression, it serves as a character-driven moment that showcases the family dynamics and relationships in a unique setting.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and original take on a family dynamic, presenting unconventional characters and situations with authenticity and humor.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are the highlight of the scene, with each family member displaying their eccentricities and quirks, adding depth to the Addams family dynamic.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in the scene, it further solidifies the established personalities of the Addams family members.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain the facade of normalcy and acceptance within their eccentric family, reflecting their desire for belonging and validation.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to prepare for a party in honor of Fester, showcasing their desire to impress and entertain their guests.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The scene lacks significant conflict but focuses more on character interactions and eccentricities.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the protagonist's internal struggle to balance their family's expectations with their own desires, creating tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on character interactions and eccentricities rather than intense conflict or high stakes situations.

Story Forward: 6

The scene doesn't propel the main plot forward but provides insight into the family dynamics and relationships, enriching the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the eccentric nature of the characters and the unexpected twists in their interactions, adding an element of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the Addams Family's unconventional values and lifestyle clashing with societal norms and expectations. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs in acceptance and individuality.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of positive and amused emotions, with moments of affection and dark humor resonating with the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, darkly humorous, and reflective of each character's personality, enhancing the overall tone of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its quirky characters, witty dialogue, and intriguing setup for the upcoming party, keeping the audience entertained and curious.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds anticipation for the upcoming party, with a balance of character interactions and plot development.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, descriptions, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedic family drama, with clear descriptions and character interactions that drive the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and macabre essence of the Addams Family, showcasing their eccentric relatives and the festive atmosphere of the party. However, the dialogue could benefit from more distinct character voices to enhance the individuality of each relative, making them more memorable.
  • The transition from the previous scene to this one is abrupt. While the shroud coming down is a visually striking moment, the cut to Fester's bedroom feels disjointed. A smoother transition could help maintain the flow of the narrative.
  • The dialogue between Fester and Abigail is functional but lacks emotional depth. Fester's desire to impress his family is clear, but the stakes could be raised by exploring his internal conflict about his identity and belonging more deeply.
  • Ophelia's character is introduced with a vivid description, but her dialogue is minimal. Expanding her lines could provide more insight into her character and enhance the comedic tone of the scene.
  • The use of visual gags, such as Cousin It arriving in his bubble-topped car, is a strong point of the scene. However, the humor could be amplified by incorporating more physical comedy or absurd interactions among the relatives during the party.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of chaos or comedic mishap during the party to highlight the Addams Family's unique brand of humor and to create a more dynamic atmosphere.
  • Enhance Fester's internal struggle by including a moment of self-doubt or a humorous reflection on his place within the family, which could add depth to his character and make his desire to look good more relatable.
  • Introduce a running gag or motif throughout the scene, such as relatives asking about Fester's whereabouts, to create a sense of anticipation and build comedic tension leading up to his eventual entrance.
  • Expand Ophelia's dialogue to include more absurd or humorous observations about the party or the family dynamics, which would help to establish her character further and contribute to the overall comedic tone.
  • Consider using more visual storytelling elements, such as reactions from the family members to Fester's preparations, to convey the atmosphere and humor without relying solely on dialogue.



Scene 40 -  A Dance of Eccentricities
101 INT. BALLROOM - A LITTLE LATER 101

Lurch escorts COUSIN IT into the ballroom. Gomez and
Morticia come over to greet him.

GOMEZ
It, old man!

COUSIN IT
Bleep gibber, ooot, ooot.

MORTICIA
You're right. Far too long.

Cousin It looks around, obviously checking out the women.
He SEES--

MARGARET

on the dance floor with Tully.

It runs a hand through his hair, slicking it back, then
excuses himself.

COUSIN IT
Ooot gibber bleep.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/17/90 73.

101 CONTINUED: 101

MARGARET

clings stiffly to Tully in the midst of all this Addams'
weirdness.

MARGARET
The first time we've been dancing
in ages, and you take me here...

TULLY
It's a formal occasion...

MARGARET
Don't let me out of your sight...

TULLY
Don't threaten me...

There's a TAP on Margaret's shoulder. She turns. Before
her is Cousin It, hat in hand, eager to cut in.

COUSIN IT
Oot, ooot, ooot.

He takes her in his arms and spins away with her.

CUT TO:

A102 OMITTED A102

B102 INT. FESTER'S BATHROOM - SAME TIME B102

The pipes groan loudly as scalding water floods the sink.
Abigail shaves the back of Fester's head with a straight
razor. The room is filled with steam.

ABIGAIL
You'll make your appearance, then slip
away from the party ...

FESTER
How? I'm the guest of honor.

CUT TO:

C102 INT. BALLROOM - SAME TIME C102

Wednesday is dancing with Lumpy Addams, the teenage
hunchback. Morticia approaches them.

MORTICIA
Wednesday?

WEDNESDAY
Yes, Mother?
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 74.

C102 CONTINUED: C102

MORTICIA
Could you run upstairs and check
on your uncle?
(as Wednesday runs off)
Thank you, dear.
(to Lumpy)
Why, Lumpy Addams. Look at you.
All grown up.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary Cousin It arrives at the Addams' lavish ballroom, eager to dance with Margaret, who feels uncomfortable at the party despite Tully's attempts to reassure her. As Cousin It cuts in on their dance, Fester is in a steamy bathroom discussing his party plans with Abigail. Meanwhile, Wednesday dances with Lumpy Addams, and Morticia asks her to check on Fester, adding to the whimsical chaos of the evening.
Strengths
  • Eccentric characters
  • Dark humor
  • Eerie atmosphere
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams family with its dark humor, eccentric characters, and morbidly affectionate moments, providing an entertaining and engaging experience for the audience.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of hosting a formal party for the Addams family, complete with eccentric relatives and unexpected interactions, is unique and well-executed, capturing the essence of the family's dark humor and eccentricity.

Plot: 7

While the scene does not heavily focus on plot progression, it effectively showcases the characters and their dynamics in a social setting, adding depth to the overall story.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of eccentric characters and their interactions, adding a fresh and comedic approach to familiar themes.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are the highlight of the scene, with each one displaying their unique quirks and personalities, adding depth and humor to the party setting.

Character Changes: 5

There are subtle character moments, but no significant changes occur during the scene as the focus is more on showcasing the characters' personalities and quirks.

Internal Goal: 8

Cousin It's internal goal is to find a dance partner and enjoy the party. This reflects his desire for social interaction and acceptance within the family.

External Goal: 7

Cousin It's external goal is to cut in and dance with Margaret, showcasing his confidence and charm.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there are minor conflicts and tensions in the scene, the focus is more on showcasing the characters and their interactions in a social setting.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with Margaret's discomfort contrasting Cousin It's confidence and desire to dance.

High Stakes: 3

The stakes are relatively low in the scene, focusing more on character interactions and humor rather than intense conflict or high stakes situations.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene does not heavily drive the main plot forward, it adds depth to the characters and their relationships, enriching the overall story.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the eccentric behavior of the characters and unexpected twists in their interactions.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict is between Margaret's discomfort with the Addams family's weirdness and Cousin It's desire to dance with her, highlighting the clash between normalcy and eccentricity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a mix of humor, affection, and eerie vibes, engaging the audience emotionally through the characters' interactions and dynamics.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the dark humor and eccentricity of the Addams family, adding to the overall atmosphere of the party.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its quirky characters, humorous dialogue, and unexpected interactions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue and action, keeping the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedic, eccentric family setting, with clear character interactions and progression.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the quirky and whimsical nature of the Addams Family, particularly through the introduction of Cousin It and his unique dialogue. However, the dialogue could benefit from more context or humor to enhance the absurdity of the situation, especially in the exchanges between Tully and Margaret.
  • The transition between Cousin It's entrance and the interactions on the dance floor feels a bit abrupt. While the cut to Fester's bathroom adds a layer of parallel storytelling, it disrupts the flow of the ballroom scene. A smoother transition or a more gradual shift in focus could help maintain the energy.
  • Margaret's discomfort is established, but her character could be fleshed out further. Adding a line or two that highlights her feelings about being at the Addams party would deepen her character and enhance the audience's understanding of her situation.
  • The humor in Cousin It's dialogue is charming, but it may not resonate with all viewers. Consider incorporating a visual gag or physical comedy that complements his dialogue, as the Addams Family is known for its visual humor.
  • The scene lacks a strong emotional or narrative arc. While it introduces characters and sets the stage for interactions, it doesn't advance the plot significantly. Consider adding a conflict or a moment of tension that could lead to a more engaging climax within the scene.
Suggestions
  • Enhance the dialogue between Tully and Margaret to include more humor or tension, perhaps by having Tully make a joke that falls flat, highlighting Margaret's discomfort.
  • Consider adding a brief moment where Cousin It interacts with other guests before cutting to Fester, showcasing his unique charm and the reactions of those around him.
  • Introduce a small conflict or comedic mishap during the dance that could serve as a catalyst for further interactions, such as Cousin It accidentally spinning Margaret too fast or Tully getting jealous.
  • Incorporate a visual gag with Cousin It that emphasizes his eccentricity, such as him accidentally knocking over a decorative item while trying to dance with Margaret.
  • Ensure that the transitions between scenes are smoother, perhaps by using a shared visual element or a line of dialogue that connects the ballroom and Fester's bathroom more cohesively.



Scene 41 -  Family Ties and Dark Secrets
102 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - A MINUTE LATER 102

The door opens and Wednesday peeks inside...

WEDNESDAY
Uncle Fester?

She hears the water running in Fester's bathroom, the
sound of voices beneath it.

INSIDE THE BATHROOM --

Fester turns off the water. The pipes make a final clang,
then there's silence.

FESTER
Yes, Mother, I understand. I hear
you.

ABIGAIL
I hope so, Gordon. I'm counting
on you. Don't buckle.

FESTER
It's not going to be easy. There
are people everywhere.

ABIGAIL
You can do it, if you just stop
whining. No one likes that, it's
unattractive.

FESTER
All right, fine. I will try and
reach the vault tonight. But if
I can't, well...
(screwing up his
courage)
Then that's it. Okay, Mother?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 1/7/91 74A.

102 CONTINUED: 102

Wednesday stands frozen in the doorway.

WEDNESDAY
You are a fake! I knew it!

Abigail and Fester wheel around on her. The straight
razor catches the light and GLINTS MENACINGLY.

ABIGAIL
Come here, little vun. Ve von't
hurt you.

Fester can't believe this is happening. He is genuinely
torn and it shows.

FESTER
Wednesday!

Abigail's facade disintegrates and she bellows.

ABIGAIL
Get her!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/29/90 75.

102 CONTINUED: 102

Abigail pushes him toward Wednesday -- who suddenly
scared, takes off running. She runs through

FESTER'S ROOM and ACROSS

103 INT. HALL - SAME TIME 103

into her own room. She slams her bedroom door behind her.

Galvanized into action by the hold his mother still has
on him, Fester KICKS the door open just in time to SEE:

A104 INT. WEDNESDAY'S ROOM - SAME TIME A104

Wednesday throws open a TRAPDOOR IN THE FLOOR and
DISAPPEARS DOWN IT, pulling the door closed behind her.
Fester tries to find it but, the door is seamless. He
pounds the floor in frustration.
CUT TO:
B104 EXT. HOUSE - SAME TIME B104

Next to the coal chute where Abigail was grabbed by the
vines, ARE TWO SMALLER CHUTES -- one marked Pugsley and
one marked Wednesday. Wednesday SLIDES OUT of her chute.
She takes off toward the cemetery.

C104 EXT. GRAVEYARD - NIGHT C104

Wednesday runs through the graveyard, and into the
darkness of the night.

104 OMITTED 104

105 OMITTED 105
Genres: ["Dark Comedy","Family","Horror"]

Summary In a tense confrontation, Wednesday discovers Uncle Fester's secretive conversation with their mother, Abigail. Fester struggles with his loyalty to Abigail, who pressures him to capture Wednesday. Accusing Fester of being a fake, Wednesday panics and escapes through a trapdoor, leaving Fester frustrated and torn between his family ties. The scene culminates with Wednesday emerging from a chute and heading toward the cemetery, while Fester is left alone, unable to follow her.
Strengths
  • Tense atmosphere
  • Revealing character dynamics
  • Sharp dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Potentially confusing sequence of events

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds tension and reveals important character dynamics, keeping the audience engaged and intrigued.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of family secrets, manipulation, and loyalty is well-developed and drives the scene forward.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses as hidden agendas are revealed, leading to heightened conflict and emotional stakes.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique characters and a suspenseful plot, with authentic dialogue that captures the essence of each character.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are complex and multifaceted, with conflicting motivations and emotions that drive the scene's tension.

Character Changes: 7

Fester experiences internal conflict and growth as he grapples with his loyalty to his family and his own desires.

Internal Goal: 8

Wednesday's internal goal in this scene is to uncover the truth about Uncle Fester and his intentions. This reflects her desire for honesty and authenticity in her relationships.

External Goal: 7

Wednesday's external goal is to escape from the dangerous situation with Abigail and Fester. This reflects the immediate challenge she is facing in this scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Fester, Abigail, and Wednesday is intense and drives the scene's emotional impact.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Wednesday facing a dangerous situation and conflicting loyalties.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high as family secrets are exposed, leading to potential betrayals and confrontations.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by revealing crucial information and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the plot, keeping the audience guessing.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between honesty and deception. Wednesday values truth and authenticity, while Fester and Abigail represent deception and manipulation.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes fear, anxiety, and tension, keeping the audience emotionally engaged.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, revealing character dynamics and adding to the suspenseful atmosphere of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its suspenseful pacing, sharp dialogue, and intriguing plot developments.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, following industry standards for screenplay format.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a suspenseful, gothic genre, building tension and conflict effectively.


Critique
  • The scene effectively builds tension through the dialogue between Fester and Abigail, showcasing their manipulative relationship. However, the stakes could be heightened further by providing more context about what Fester is being pressured to do, which would clarify the urgency of the situation for the audience.
  • Wednesday's entrance is impactful, but her accusation of Fester being a fake feels somewhat abrupt. It would benefit from a stronger lead-in that establishes her suspicions earlier in the narrative, making her confrontation feel more earned and less like a sudden plot twist.
  • Abigail's character is portrayed as menacing, but her dialogue could be more nuanced. Instead of simply telling Fester not to whine, she could use more psychological manipulation, perhaps by recalling a past failure of his to create a deeper emotional impact.
  • The physical action of Fester kicking the door open is a strong visual moment, but it could be enhanced by showing more of his internal conflict. A brief moment of hesitation before he acts could add depth to his character, illustrating the struggle between his loyalty to Abigail and his affection for Wednesday.
  • The transition from the tension in the bathroom to Wednesday escaping through the trapdoor is effective, but the pacing could be improved. The scene could benefit from a moment of stillness or a brief pause before the chase begins, allowing the audience to absorb the gravity of the situation before the action escalates.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a line or two of dialogue that hints at what Fester is supposed to do regarding the vault, which would clarify the stakes and make the audience more invested in the outcome.
  • Introduce Wednesday's suspicions earlier in the scene or in previous scenes to create a stronger narrative thread leading to her confrontation with Fester.
  • Enhance Abigail's dialogue to include more psychological manipulation, perhaps referencing past failures or insecurities of Fester to deepen the emotional stakes.
  • Include a moment of hesitation for Fester before he kicks the door open, showcasing his internal conflict and making his eventual action more impactful.
  • Add a brief pause or moment of stillness after the confrontation before Wednesday escapes, allowing the audience to fully grasp the tension and stakes of the situation.



Scene 42 -  A Dance of Eccentricity
106 INT. BALLROOM - SAME TIME 106

Lurch escorts

FLORA AND FAUNA AMOR,

the twins from the home movies, into the ballroom. He
takes their wraps revealing that they are, in fact, a pair
of SIAMESE TWINS. Twenty-five years later, they still
look quite beautiful and quite mad.

GOMEZ (O.S.)
Flora and Fauna Amor!

Gomez approaches, shielding his eyes.

GOMEZ
I cannot see! I'm blinded by beauty!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 76.

106 CONTINUED: 106
FLORA
Gomez Addams....

FAUNA
... you terrible flirt...

FLORA
... always was...

FAUNA
... at least with me...

FLORA
Copycat!

FAUNA
Tag-along!

Morticia appears.

MORTICIA
Why, Gomez. The Amor twins. I've
heard so much about you.

FLORA
Morticia! I hate you!

FAUNA
... you nabbed him, this darling
man...

FLORA
... he was mine...

FAUNA
... he was mine...

MORTICIA
Flora, Fauna, how can I compete?
You're twice the woman I am.

Gomez grabs Tully, who is striding by in search of
Margaret.

GOMEZ
Tully, the Amor twins. They're
waiting for Fester. Amuse them.

FLORA
(flirting)
Hello, Tully...

FAUNA
I saw him first...
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/26/90 77.

106 CONTINUED: (2) 106

FLORA
(to Tully)
Ignore her...

FAUNA
(to Tully)
She's nothing...

MORTICIA
(calling after them)
Bon chance!

The girls now have their four arms all over Tully, leading
him onto the dance floor.

TULLY
Oh my God...

CUT TO:

A107 OMITTED A107

107 INT. FESTER'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME 107

Abigail is in the room alone. At that moment, Fester
comes climbing back through the open window.

FESTER
I couldn't find her anywhere. Let's
just leave - out the back.

ABIGAIL
Pull yourself together. She'll turn
up - the little cockroach. Now get
to the party - or they'll suspect
something. I'll be down soon.
(using her accent)
Ja?

CUT TO:

A108 OMITTED A108
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/17/90 78/79.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a lavish ballroom, Lurch introduces the striking Siamese twins, Flora and Fauna Amor, who immediately capture attention with their beauty and playful banter. Gomez flirts with the twins, igniting a humorous rivalry with Morticia, who acknowledges their charm. The twins tease Morticia and quickly turn their attention to Tully, leading him onto the dance floor amidst laughter and flirtation. The scene is light-hearted, filled with witty exchanges and playful jealousy, culminating in Tully's surprised reaction as he is swept away by the twins.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Comedic interactions
  • Character dynamics
  • Eccentric characters
Weaknesses
  • Low conflict level
  • Limited plot progression

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written with witty dialogue, comedic elements, and intriguing character dynamics. It effectively blends humor with darker undertones, keeping the audience engaged.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of introducing the Siamese twins, Flora and Fauna Amor, in a humorous and flirtatious manner fits well within the overall tone of the Addams Family universe. The scene effectively introduces new characters while maintaining the dark comedy theme.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in the scene focuses on the arrival of the Amor twins and their interactions with the Addams Family members. While it doesn't significantly advance the main storyline, it adds depth to the characters and provides comedic moments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces Siamese twins as characters, adding a fresh and unique element to the story. The dialogue is quirky and unconventional, reflecting the authenticity of the characters.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene, including Flora, Fauna, Gomez, Morticia, and Tully, are well-developed and showcase their unique personalities through witty dialogue and comedic interactions. The eccentricity of the Addams Family is highlighted through character dynamics.

Character Changes: 4

There are minor character changes, particularly in the interactions between Flora, Fauna, and the Addams Family members. The scene sets the stage for potential character development and evolving relationships.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain his charm and wit in the presence of the Amor twins, despite their flirtatious banter. This reflects his desire to be seen as desirable and charismatic.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to entertain the Amor twins and ensure they have a good time at the party. This reflects his desire to maintain harmony and enjoyment in social situations.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there are minor conflicts and tensions in the scene, such as flirtatious banter and character dynamics, the overall conflict level is relatively low. The focus is more on comedic interactions and character introductions.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with subtle conflicts and tensions between the characters that add depth and complexity to the interactions.

High Stakes: 3

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on comedic interactions and character introductions. While there are tensions and conflicts, they are not high-stakes situations.

Story Forward: 6

The scene introduces new characters, expands on existing relationships, and sets the stage for future interactions. While it doesn't significantly advance the main plot, it adds depth to the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected interactions and dynamics between the characters, adding a sense of intrigue and excitement.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the competition for attention and affection between Morticia and the Amor twins. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs about love, loyalty, and attraction.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a mix of negative sentiments, amusement, and conflicted emotions from the characters, adding depth to their interactions. While there are emotional moments, the primary focus is on humor and dark comedy.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue in the scene is witty, sarcastic, and humorous, capturing the essence of the Addams Family's dark humor. The banter between characters adds depth to their relationships and enhances the comedic elements.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the witty dialogue, eccentric characters, and playful interactions that keep the audience entertained and intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a good balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions that maintain the audience's interest and momentum.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, adhering to industry standards for screenplay formatting.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a comedic, character-driven scene in a screenplay.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and eccentric tone of the Addams Family, showcasing the playful banter between characters. However, the dialogue could benefit from more distinct voices for Flora and Fauna to enhance their individuality as characters. Currently, their lines feel somewhat interchangeable, which diminishes their unique personalities.
  • The introduction of the Siamese twins is visually striking, but the scene could delve deeper into their relationship with Gomez and Morticia. Adding a line or two that hints at their past interactions or shared history would enrich the context and deepen the audience's understanding of their dynamics.
  • The humor in the scene is strong, particularly with Gomez's flirtation and Morticia's witty retorts. However, the pacing feels slightly rushed, especially when transitioning from the twins' introduction to Tully's involvement. A brief pause or reaction shot could allow the audience to absorb the humor before moving on.
  • The conflict introduced with Tully being overwhelmed by the twins is amusing, but it lacks a clear resolution or follow-up. It would be beneficial to explore Tully's discomfort further, perhaps through his internal thoughts or a humorous reaction, to enhance the comedic effect.
  • The scene ends abruptly with Tully being led to the dance floor, which feels like a missed opportunity for a punchline or a humorous twist. A final quip from Tully or a reaction from Morticia could provide a more satisfying conclusion to the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider giving Flora and Fauna more distinct personalities through their dialogue. This could involve unique phrases or mannerisms that set them apart, making them more memorable.
  • Add a line or two that references past interactions between the twins and the Addams family to provide context and deepen the audience's understanding of their relationships.
  • Slow down the pacing slightly after the twins' introduction to allow for comedic timing. A reaction shot or pause could enhance the humor and give the audience a moment to appreciate the banter.
  • Explore Tully's discomfort with the twins further, perhaps through a humorous internal monologue or a physical reaction that highlights his unease.
  • Consider adding a final humorous line or reaction from Tully or Morticia to provide a more satisfying and comedic conclusion to the scene.



Scene 43 -  A Festive Feast with Family Tensions
B108 INT. KITCHEN - SAME TIME B108

Morticia watches as Granny garnishes a ROAST PIG set on
silver tray. It is beautifully glazed, deliciously plump
and has an apple in its mouth.

MORTICIA
Mama, you've outdone yourself.

Granny turns the roast pig slightly to arrange the
garnish and reveals its SECOND HEAD. This one too has an
apple in its mouth.

GRANNY
Hey - it's a party.

Satisfied, she covers it with a lid. Lurch then lifts
the tray onto a serving cart, and rolls the cart out.

CUT TO:

C108 INT. BALLROOM - SAME TIME C108

Flora and Fauna, now on the dance floor with Tully,
chatter giddily as he tries to maneuver them through a
box-step.

FLORA
You can't imagine how surprised we
were when Gomez called and told us
Fester was back...

FAUNA
Especially considering...

FLORA
(rolls her eyes
heavenward)
Fauna...

TULLY
Especially considering what?

FLORA
It makes no difference now. It's
obvious that Fester and Gomez are
devoted.

TULLY
Why wouldn't they be devoted?

FAUNA
Well, now that Fester's back, he's
the king of the castle again, isn't
he?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/28/91 80.

C108 CONTINUED: C108

FLORA
Fester's the older brother. So he
gets it all. The house, the
money - you name it.

FAUNA
I'd like to...

FLORA
Gomez be damned.

FAUNA
Fester's still single, isn't he?

FLORA
(flirting)
Are you, Mr. Alford?

TULLY
Why, Fauna...

FAUNA
I'm Fauna!

FLORA
I'm Flora!

TULLY
I'm flattered. Excuse me, ladies?

Tully winks at Flora and blows a kiss to Fauna; they
giggle madly. Tully hurries off, grinning like the cat
who swallowed the canary.

CUT TO:

D108 OMITTED D108

E108 OMITTED E108

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 80A.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a whimsical kitchen, Morticia admires a quirky roast pig with two heads prepared by Granny, while Lurch assists with the serving. Simultaneously, in the ballroom, Flora and Fauna discuss the implications of Fester's return on Gomez and the family dynamics, all while Tully flirts with both women. The scene blends dark humor with playful banter, culminating in Tully's flirtatious farewell, leaving Flora and Fauna giggling.
Strengths
  • Eccentric characters
  • Witty dialogue
  • Humorous interactions
Weaknesses
  • Lack of intense conflict
  • Minor character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams Family with its dark humor, eccentric characters, and playful interactions, creating an entertaining and engaging atmosphere.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a lavish ballroom party for the Addams Family allows for the exploration of their unique personalities, relationships, and dynamics in a humorous and entertaining setting.

Plot: 7

While the scene doesn't heavily focus on plot progression, it effectively introduces new elements, conflicts, and character dynamics that contribute to the overall story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and unconventional elements, such as the second head on the roast pig, and explores unique family dynamics within a gothic setting. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to the Addams Family universe.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The scene excels in showcasing the distinct personalities of the Addams Family members and their guests, highlighting their quirks, humor, and relationships in a compelling manner.

Character Changes: 5

There are minor character developments and revelations in the scene, but the focus is more on showcasing the characters' existing traits and dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal is to maintain the facade of a perfect family gathering despite the bizarre and unexpected events happening around her. This reflects her desire for control and composure in the face of chaos.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to navigate the social dynamics and expectations of the family gathering, particularly in relation to Fester's return and his role in the family hierarchy.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are subtle conflicts and tensions present in the scene, the focus is more on humor, character dynamics, and interactions rather than intense conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and desires among the characters that create tension and uncertainty.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on humor, character interactions, and setting up future conflicts and developments.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new elements, conflicts, and character dynamics that will likely impact future events and developments.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected reveal of the second head on the roast pig and the shifting dynamics between characters. The audience is kept on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of family loyalty, inheritance, and individual identity. Flora and Fauna's conversation highlights the tension between familial obligations and personal desires.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a light-hearted and amused emotional response from the audience, focusing more on humor and entertainment rather than deep emotional engagement.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, humorous, and engaging, effectively capturing the unique voices of each character and driving the interactions forward.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of humor, intrigue, and character dynamics. The dialogue and interactions between characters keep the audience invested in the unfolding events.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions that maintain the audience's interest and drive the narrative forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with distinct beats and transitions between the kitchen and ballroom settings. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and darkly humorous tone characteristic of the Addams Family. The juxtaposition of a beautifully garnished roast pig with a second head is a classic example of the Addams' macabre humor, which is well-executed here.
  • Morticia's line, 'Mama, you've outdone yourself,' establishes a warm familial bond and appreciation for Granny's culinary skills, which adds depth to their relationship. However, the dialogue could benefit from more character-specific nuances to further differentiate Morticia and Granny's voices.
  • The transition from the kitchen to the ballroom is smooth, but the scene could use more visual cues or actions that connect the two locations. For instance, a brief moment where Morticia and Granny share a knowing look about the party's eccentricity could enhance the continuity.
  • The dialogue between Flora, Fauna, and Tully is playful and captures the competitive nature of the Addams family dynamics. However, the exposition regarding Fester's return feels a bit heavy-handed. It could be more subtly woven into their banter to maintain the scene's lightness.
  • Tully's character comes off as somewhat one-dimensional in this scene. While he is portrayed as flattered and eager, adding a layer of insecurity or ambition could make him more relatable and engaging. His interactions with the twins could also be more dynamic, showcasing his discomfort or excitement in a more exaggerated manner.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of physical comedy or visual gags in the kitchen, such as Granny accidentally dropping a garnish or Lurch struggling with the tray, to enhance the humor and keep the scene lively.
  • Revise the dialogue to make it more character-specific. For example, Granny could have a quirky saying or a humorous remark about the roast pig that reflects her personality, while Morticia could express her delight in a more poetic or darkly romantic way.
  • Incorporate more physical interactions between Tully and the twins to emphasize their flirtation. For instance, Tully could awkwardly try to dance with both at once, leading to comedic chaos that highlights his character's charm and ineptitude.
  • To improve the exposition about Fester, consider having Flora and Fauna make more playful, cryptic comments about his return that hint at their ulterior motives or jealousy, rather than stating it outright. This would keep the audience engaged and curious.
  • Add a moment where Morticia observes the ballroom from the kitchen, perhaps commenting on the chaos or the guests, which would create a stronger connection between the two scenes and reinforce her role as the family matriarch.



Scene 44 -  Fester's Fearless Fiesta
108 INT. BALLROOM - SAME TIME 108

Morticia and Fester have appeared at the door to the
ballroom.

MORTICIA
Everyone. Your attention please.

The music stops, and the guests fall silent.

MORTICIA
When he was lost, our family grieved.
And how it became them. Now he is
found, and our celebration begins.
Our treasured guest of honor --
Fester Addams.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/6/90 81.

108 CONTINUED: 108

She takes him by the hand as if to lead him toward the
assembled guests - but instead ABRUPTLY SPINS HIM BY
THE ARM, sending him whirling like a top into the

CENTER OF THE DANCE FLOOR

where he suddenly STOPS, NOSE-TO-NOSE WITH GOMEZ. Gomez
has changed clothes -- he's dressed now like a Hollywood
Cossack. He carries FIVE GLEAMING SCIMITARS.

Morticia, Granny, and all the Addams women rap out a
stirring martial beat on tambourines.

GOMEZ
The Mamushka!

Gomez begins to CIRCLE around Fester.

The other family members form a ring, CIRCLING COUNTER-
CLOCKWISE to Gomez.

Gomez then throws the scimitars straight up, high into
the air, and begins juggling them.

Baffled, Fester stands in the center, the eye of this
dizzying hurricane.

GOMEZ
Taught to us by our Cossack cousins,
the Mamushka has been an Addams family
tradition since God-knows-when...

Gomez hurls the scimitars to Fester. They begin JUGGLING
THEM BACK AND FORTH -- MUCH TO FESTER'S SHOCK AND SURPRISE.

GOMEZ
...We danced the Mamushka while Nero
fiddled! We danced the Mamushka at
Waterloo! We danced the Mamushka for
Jack the Ripper, and now, Fester
Addams, this Mamushka's for you!

The juggling continues. The MOVES GET MORE AND MORE
INTRICATE. It's an ELABORATE, CAREFULLY CHOREOGRAPHED
ROUTINE. Fester, petrified, manages to somehow bungle
his way through.

They launch into a TONGUE-TWISTING PATTER SONG. Fester
stumbles his way through. During an instrumental passage
of the song, Gomez admires his brother.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/6/90 82.

108 CONTINUED: (2) 108

GOMEZ
After all this time Fester hasn't
forgotten a step, hasn't forgotten
a word!

Fester STOPS DEAD.

FESTER
(astonished)
Not a step, not a word...

Fester has missed a beat and looks up to SEE --

ALL FIVE SCIMITARS --

DROPPING FAST, coming straight at him.

Panicking, he CATCHES... ONE, TWO, THREE, FOUR -- with
two in each hand, his hands are full. What's he going
to do with

THE FIFTH SCIMITAR?

HE OPENS HIS MOUTH TO SCREAM. IT DROPS STRAIGHT IN. HE
SWALLOWS IT TO THE HILT.

The Addams mob CHEERS LUSTILY and launches into the
finale of the song.

Amazed, Fester drops the scimitars he holds and pulls
the one from his mouth.

FESTER
How did I do that?

Gomez slaps him on the back. Fester burps. The Addams
cheer again. They close in on Fester.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a grand ballroom, Morticia introduces Fester as the guest of honor, leading to a lively celebration featuring the Mamushka dance. Gomez, dressed as a Hollywood Cossack, dazzles the crowd with his scimitar juggling, while the Addams family provides musical accompaniment. Initially confused, Fester joins in and surprisingly juggles the scimitars himself, only to comically swallow one in a moment of panic. The family cheers him on, culminating in laughter and amazement as Fester retrieves the swallowed weapon, showcasing the chaotic yet festive spirit of the celebration.
Strengths
  • Humor
  • Eccentricity
  • Choreography
  • Character Interactions
Weaknesses
  • Minimal Plot Progression
  • Low Stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is highly entertaining, filled with humor, unique traditions, and character interactions that keep the audience engaged. The comedic elements, choreographed dance routine, and unexpected twist with the scimitars add to the overall enjoyment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a traditional Addams family celebration with a unique dance and comedic elements is engaging and fits well within the overall tone of the screenplay. The scene effectively showcases the family's eccentricities and traditions.

Plot: 7

While the scene doesn't significantly advance the main plot, it serves as a fun and entertaining interlude that highlights the characters' relationships and quirks. It adds depth to the family dynamics and showcases their unique traditions.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its unconventional family dynamics, bizarre talents, and unexpected twists in the juggling act with scimitars.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric personalities, adding humor and depth to the scene. The interactions between Gomez, Fester, and the rest of the family members are entertaining and engaging.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in this scene, as it primarily focuses on showcasing the characters' eccentricities and relationships rather than significant personal growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to prove himself worthy of being reunited with his family and to overcome his feelings of inadequacy and uncertainty.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to impress his family and show that he belongs with them.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The conflict in the scene is minimal, focusing more on comedic misunderstandings and mishaps rather than intense dramatic conflict. The tension is light-hearted and adds to the humor of the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from Fester's own doubts and fears, as well as the challenge of impressing his eccentric family members with his juggling act.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on comedic and celebratory elements rather than high-stakes drama. The main focus is on entertainment and showcasing the family's unique traditions.

Story Forward: 6

The scene contributes to the overall world-building and character development but does not significantly move the main plot forward. It adds depth to the Addams family dynamics and traditions.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twist of Fester swallowing a scimitar, adding a surprising and comedic element to the performance.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict revolves around the Addams family's unique values and traditions conflicting with societal norms and expectations.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits a moderate emotional impact through humor, celebration, and character interactions. While it may not evoke deep emotions, it entertains and engages the audience with its whimsical tone.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and in line with the quirky nature of the Addams family. It adds to the comedic tone of the scene and enhances the character interactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of physical comedy, suspense, and absurdity, keeping the audience entertained and invested in Fester's performance.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene builds tension and excitement as Fester juggles the scimitars, leading to a climactic and surprising moment with the swallowing of the fifth scimitar.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to the expected format for a comedic screenplay, with clear action lines and dialogue cues.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that builds tension and humor through the juggling act and Fester's unexpected swallowing of a scimitar.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and chaotic essence of the Addams Family, showcasing their unique blend of humor and eccentricity. Morticia's introduction of Fester sets a celebratory tone, but the abrupt spin into the dance floor could benefit from a clearer visual cue to enhance the comedic timing.
  • Gomez's character shines in this scene, particularly with his flamboyant costume and juggling act. However, the dialogue could be tightened to maintain the rhythm of the Mamushka dance. The tongue-twisting patter song is a clever addition, but it may risk losing the audience's attention if not executed with precision.
  • Fester's astonishment and subsequent panic when faced with the scimitars is a strong comedic moment, but the transition from his shock to swallowing the scimitar feels rushed. A brief pause or reaction shot could heighten the tension and make the moment more impactful.
  • The cheering from the Addams family adds to the celebratory atmosphere, but it might be more effective if the cheers were interspersed with specific lines of encouragement or playful banter, enhancing the familial bond and the absurdity of the situation.
  • The ending, where Fester questions how he managed to swallow the scimitar, is humorous and fits the Addams Family's darkly comedic style. However, it could be strengthened by a more exaggerated reaction from Gomez or the family, reinforcing the absurdity of the moment.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a visual gag or a humorous reaction from the guests as Morticia spins Fester into the center of the dance floor to enhance the comedic impact.
  • Tighten the dialogue during the Mamushka dance to maintain a brisk pace and ensure the audience remains engaged throughout the performance.
  • Introduce a brief pause or a reaction shot from Fester before he swallows the scimitar to build tension and make the moment more memorable.
  • Incorporate specific lines of encouragement or playful banter from the family during the juggling act to deepen the sense of camaraderie and absurdity.
  • Enhance Fester's final line about swallowing the scimitar with a more exaggerated reaction from Gomez or the family, emphasizing the humor and absurdity of the situation.



Scene 45 -  Waltz of Whimsy and Schemes
A109 INT. A REMOTE CORNER OF THE BALLROOM - SAME TIME A109

Cousin It and Margaret are waltzing in an out-of-the-way
nook; they are somewhat involved.

MARGARET
We've been married for almost twenty
years... sometimes it seems like
more...

COUSIN IT
Ooot oot blipper.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/26/90 83.

A109 CONTINUED: A109

MARGARET
Of course, people grow, people
change...

COUSIN IT
Glibber gleep gleep.

CUT TO:

109 INT. FRONT HALL - A LITTLE LATER. 109

Tully is heading for the front door, in his coat. Abigail
stops him.

ABIGAIL
Where are you going? There's
trouble.

TULLY
Hey - not to worry. Plan B.

ABIGAIL
But that hideous little girl...

TULLY
(interrupts)
I'm in charge. Ten minutes - I'll be
back.

Tully slips out the door. Abigail turns, frustrated,
throwing up her hands. Upstairs, on the dance floor, a
reprise of the Mamushka has begun. In the rear of the
hall, Cousin It passes across, leading a trembling
Margaret.

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110 EXT. JUDGE WOMACK'S HOME - A SHORT WHILE LATER 110

Judge Womack is on the front porch with Tully. He's
apoplectic. The raucous sounds of the Mamushka rever-
berate from the Addams mansion.

JUDGE WOMACK
What the hell's going on over
there?

TULLY
How would you like to be rid of
the Addamses for good? I'm serious.

JUDGE WOMACK
(smiling)
What can I do for you?

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 84.

111 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION - TWO O'CLOCK A.M. 111

Gomez and Morticia stand on the front steps waving
good-bye to their departing guests.

Cousin It leans out the window of his limousine, sharing
a romantic last moment with Margaret.

MARGARET
You're a marvelous dancer. It's
been such fun.

COUSIN IT
Ooot ooot gibber.

MARGARET
(torn)
I can't. We musn't.
(a beat)
Call me?

The limo drives off, as Margaret waves a fond farewell.
The limo passes --

Morticia appears. She puts her arm around Margaret as
It drives off.

MORTICIA
Oh, Margaret... he's very special,
isn't he?

MARGARET
(sighing)
He's perfect.

MORTICIA
He's It.

Flora and Fauna giving good-bye kisses to Fester, covering
him with lipstick; they hang on him with all four arms. He
is enjoying himself.

FLORA
You'll come see me before you
leave, won't you, Fester?

FAUNA
(to Fester,
confidentially)
I'll call, once I'm alone.

An AMBULANCE pulls up. White-jacketed ATTENDANTS step out,
with a straight-jacket built for two.

FESTER
There's your ride! Good-bye, girls!

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 A84A.

112 INT. UPSTAIRS HALLWAY - A BIT LATER 112

Fester skips down the hall, still practicing bits of the
Mamushka, the Amor Twins' kisses still fresh on his cheeks.
He opens the door and strides into --
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a secluded ballroom corner, Cousin It and Margaret share a waltz, reminiscing about their marriage while Tully plots against the Addams family, dismissing Abigail's concerns. Outside the mansion, Tully proposes a scheme to Judge Womack, who shows interest. Meanwhile, Gomez and Morticia bid farewell to their guests, and Fester enjoys the attention of Flora and Fauna, oblivious to an ambulance arriving for him. The scene blends romance and comedy, highlighting the whimsical chaos of the evening.
Strengths
  • Eccentric characters
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Romantic moments
  • Lively atmosphere
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development
  • Slightly predictable plot twists

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-crafted, blending humor, romance, and suspense effectively. It showcases the unique characteristics of the Addams family and advances the plot while entertaining the audience.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a lively ballroom party with eccentric characters, romantic moments, and high stakes is well-developed and adds depth to the overall story. The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams family.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the Mamushka dance, introducing new characters, showcasing relationships, and building tension. It moves the story forward while providing entertaining moments.

Originality: 9

The scene features original characters, dialogue, and situations that subvert traditional storytelling conventions.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-defined and stay true to their eccentric personalities. Each character adds depth to the scene and contributes to the overall dynamics of the Addams family.

Character Changes: 6

While there are subtle shifts in character dynamics, such as Fester's interactions with Flora and Fauna, the scene focuses more on showcasing the characters' eccentricities and relationships rather than significant character development.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to navigate the complexities of their relationships and emotions, as seen in Margaret's conflicted feelings towards Cousin It.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to handle a situation involving trouble and a hideous little girl, as seen in Tully's interactions with Abigail and Judge Womack.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are elements of conflict, such as Abigail's manipulation and Tully's schemes, the scene focuses more on humor, romance, and celebration. The conflict adds tension but is not the central focus.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene adds tension and conflict, driving the plot forward and keeping the audience engaged.

High Stakes: 7

The high stakes in the scene revolve around Fester's departure, Abigail's schemes, and the tension surrounding the Mamushka dance. The stakes add suspense and urgency to the events unfolding.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing new characters, setting up conflicts, and building towards the climactic Mamushka dance. It advances the plot while entertaining the audience.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to its eccentric characters, unexpected plot twists, and dark humor.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between societal expectations and individual desires, as seen in Margaret's internal struggle with her feelings for Cousin It.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from amusement to nostalgia to tension. The romantic moments between characters and the high stakes of the Mamushka dance add emotional depth to the scene.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, humorous, and reflective of each character's unique traits. It enhances the interactions between characters and adds to the overall charm of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of humor, drama, and mystery, keeping the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, balancing dialogue, action, and character interactions effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and follows the expected format for its genre, enhancing readability and flow.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a non-linear structure that adds to the surreal and comedic elements of the story.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Cousin It and Margaret is amusing but lacks depth. While the playful banter fits the Addams Family's quirky tone, it could benefit from more emotional resonance or conflict to enhance the stakes of their relationship. As it stands, it feels somewhat superficial.
  • The transition from the intimate moment between Cousin It and Margaret to Tully and Abigail's conversation is abrupt. This shift could be smoother, perhaps by incorporating a visual or thematic link between the two scenes to maintain narrative flow.
  • Tully's dialogue with Abigail feels somewhat clichéd, particularly the phrase 'I'm in charge.' This could be an opportunity to showcase Tully's character more distinctly, perhaps by giving him a unique way of asserting control that aligns with his personality.
  • The introduction of Judge Womack is effective in escalating the tension, but his motivations could be clearer. Why is he so eager to assist Tully? Adding a line or two that hints at his own grievances with the Addams family could provide more context and depth to his character.
  • The scene ends with Fester skipping down the hall, which is a light-hearted moment, but it may feel disconnected from the tension established earlier with Tully and Abigail. A stronger thematic or emotional link between these moments could enhance the overall cohesion of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of vulnerability or conflict in the dialogue between Cousin It and Margaret to deepen their relationship and make their interaction more engaging.
  • Smooth the transition between scenes by incorporating a visual element or thematic connection that links Cousin It's romantic moment with the tension of Tully and Abigail's conversation.
  • Revise Tully's dialogue to reflect his character more distinctly, perhaps by using a unique phrase or action that showcases his personality and motivations.
  • Provide more context for Judge Womack's eagerness to help Tully, possibly by hinting at his own issues with the Addams family, to create a more layered character.
  • Create a stronger thematic or emotional connection between Fester's joyful moment and the preceding tension to enhance the scene's overall cohesion and impact.



Scene 46 -  A Dance of Disapproval
113 INT. FESTER'S ROOM - SAME TIME 113

Fester dances into the room. He grabs Abigail and starts
dancing with her, swinging her around and singing bits of
the patter song.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/13/91 84A.

113 CONTINUED: 113
ABIGAIL
Gordon?

Fester keeps singing and dancing.

ABIGAIL
Gordon! Stop it! This instant!

Fester lets her go.

ABIGAIL
Gordon, is that... lipstick? All over
your face?

FESTER
(still giddy)
From the twins! The beauteous Amor twins!

ABIGAIL
The twins? Gordon, I don't understand
this. Let me get this clear. Have
you... have you been having a good time?

FESTER
(jubilant)
Yes, I have! It was marvelous - I
sang up a storm! And I danced 'till
I dropped! The Mamushka!

He begins to dance again. Abigail, breathing fire, sits
on the bed, turning away from him.

FESTER
Mother?

ABIGAIL
Mother? Mother? Who is that? I
don't think I recall.

FESTER
Mother...

ABIGAIL
I'm perfectly fine. I'm dandy. Don't
concern yourself with me, Gordon.
Please, return to your depraved orgy.
Sometimes I think you're not even my son.

FESTER
Don't say that!

ABIGAIL
I'm just your mother. You only owe me
your entire existence on this planet.
Please, Gordon, by all means - go.
Sing. Dance. Date.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 85.

113 CONTINUED: (2) 113

FESTER
(coming to his senses)
Mother, I'm... I'm so terribly
sorry...
(he kneels at her side)
It was just a party. It's over.
It means nothing. Those Siamese
twins, that hunchback, Cousin It
- they're not you.

ABIGAIL
(clutching him
savagely)
Say it, Gordon. Make me believe it.

FESTER
I love you. And I want money.

ABIGAIL
(very no-nonsense)
We've got to find Tully.

CUT TO:

114 INT. BALLROOM - SAME TIME 114

Morticia is looking for her children. She discovers
Pugsley ASLEEP, curled up on the SILVER PLATTER WHERE THE
TWO-HEADED PIG LAY. She finds this enchanting.

Gomez enters. Morticia shushes him; she points to the
platter.

MORTICIA
(whispering)
Look - our little boy.

GOMEZ
(whispering)
All tuckered out.

MORTICIA
(whispering)
So sweet. He looks just... like
a little entree.

Pugsley wakes up; he looks around.

PUGSLEY
(sleepy)
Where... where's the party?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 86.

114 CONTINUED: 114

MORTICIA
It's over, darling - have you seen
your sister?

PUGSLEY
Not since before the Mamushka.

MORTICIA
Gomez?

GOMEZ
Don't fret - we'll find her.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary Fester joyfully enters his room after a party, only to be confronted by his stern mother, Abigail, about the lipstick on his face. As she expresses her disapproval and seeks reassurance of his love, Fester shifts from exuberance to remorse, humorously asking for money while reaffirming his loyalty. The scene highlights their emotional disconnect but ends with Abigail insisting they need to focus on finding Tully, shifting their priorities.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Lack of high stakes
  • Some repetitive humor

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, affection, and whimsy, showcasing the eccentricities of the Addams family while advancing the plot.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene revolves around family dynamics, humor, and affection, all of which are effectively portrayed.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses as Fester navigates his conflicting emotions and Abigail's manipulation, while Morticia and Gomez search for their missing children, adding tension and humor.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces unique characters and situations, such as Fester's wild party antics and Abigail's sarcastic dialogue, adding freshness to the familiar family conflict theme.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with distinct personalities and quirks that drive the scene's humor and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 6

Fester experiences a moment of clarity and reconciliation with Abigail, showcasing a subtle character change.

Internal Goal: 8

Fester's internal goal is to seek approval and love from his mother, Abigail. His actions and dialogue reflect his desire for acceptance and validation.

External Goal: 7

Fester's external goal is to apologize and make amends for his behavior at the party. He wants to reassure his mother and repair their relationship.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict between Fester and Abigail, as well as the search for Wednesday, adds tension and humor to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition between Fester and Abigail adds conflict and emotional depth to the scene, creating obstacles for Fester's internal and external goals.

High Stakes: 5

While the stakes are not extremely high in this scene, the emotional and comedic elements keep the audience engaged.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by resolving conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up future events.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in its character interactions and emotional dynamics, creating tension and uncertainty about the outcome of Fester and Abigail's confrontation.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The scene presents a conflict between Fester's desire for fun and freedom and Abigail's expectations of him as her son. This challenges Fester's beliefs about his identity and relationships.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits both humor and affection from the audience, creating an emotional connection to the characters.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, sarcastic, and emotionally resonant, capturing the essence of the Addams family's unique communication style.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its mix of humor, drama, and emotional conflict, keeping the audience invested in the characters' relationships and motivations.

Pacing: 8

The scene's pacing effectively builds tension and emotional intensity through dialogue and character actions, contributing to its overall effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene's formatting adheres to industry standards, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting, enhancing readability and clarity.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character interactions and progression of events, fitting the expected format for a dark comedy genre.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures Fester's exuberance and the contrast between his joy and Abigail's disapproval. However, the dialogue could benefit from more subtext to deepen the emotional stakes. Abigail's reaction feels somewhat one-dimensional, and exploring her motivations could add complexity to her character.
  • Fester's jubilance is well-portrayed, but the transition from his excitement to Abigail's confrontation could be smoother. The abrupt shift in tone might confuse the audience. Consider adding a moment where Fester's joy is visibly dampened before Abigail's confrontation to enhance the emotional impact.
  • The humor in Fester's obliviousness to Abigail's anger is a strong point, but it could be amplified by incorporating more physical comedy or visual gags. For instance, Fester could accidentally knock something over while dancing, which would add to the chaotic energy of the scene.
  • The dialogue between Fester and Abigail is witty, but it could be more dynamic. Currently, it feels a bit static. Introducing interruptions or overlapping dialogue could create a more natural flow and enhance the comedic timing.
  • The scene ends with a shift in focus to finding Tully, which feels abrupt. A more gradual transition or a line that hints at the urgency of finding Tully could provide a smoother segue into the next scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Fester realizes the absurdity of his situation before Abigail confronts him, which would heighten the emotional stakes.
  • Incorporate more physical comedy elements, such as Fester accidentally bumping into furniture or tripping while dancing, to enhance the humor of the scene.
  • Explore Abigail's character further by giving her a line or two that reveals her deeper feelings about Fester's behavior, which could add layers to her disapproval.
  • Experiment with overlapping dialogue or interruptions during the conversation between Fester and Abigail to create a more dynamic and engaging exchange.
  • Add a line or visual cue at the end of the scene that hints at the urgency of finding Tully, providing a smoother transition to the next scene.



Scene 47 -  The Search for Wednesday
115 EXT. ADDAMS YARD - LATER 115

Gomez rallies the family for the search. Morticia wears
a black cloak. Granny has grabbed her divining rod.
Lurch distributes torches, then stands aside, awaiting
instructions. Pugsley helps Gomez unroll an ancient map
of the area.

GOMEZ
Fan out. Pugsley - head for the dung
heap. Mama and Morticia - the shallow
graves. I'll take the abyss, and
Lurch - check the bottomless pit.

MORTICIA
(worried)
Her favorite...

GOMEZ
(calls out)
Fester!!

FESTER (O.S.)
Up here.

They look up at Fester, looking down at them from
Wednesday's window.

GOMEZ
Fester! You take the ravine! And
the unmarked, abandoned well!

FESTER
Somebody should stay behind - in
case she comes back.

GOMEZ
Good man! Good thinking!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 87.

115 CONTINUED: 115

GRANNY
Then who'll take the swamp?

Thing tugs at the cuff of Gomez's pants. Gomez nods.

GOMEZ
That's the spirit, Thing - lend a
hand! Let's go!

They all sweep off, with Gomez in the lead.

116 INT. WEDNESDAY'S ROOM - A SHORT WHILE LATER 116

Fester is still at the window. Abigail joins him.

THEIR POV

Spread far and wide over the grounds, the various members
of the family search for Wednesday, tiny lights aloft,
calling.

ABIGAIL
Where the hell is Tully?

They head out.

CUT TO:

117 OMITTED 117

118 INT. DEN - A LITTLE LATER 118

Fester and Virginia find...

TULLY -

sitting in an armchair, basking in the rays of sunshine
that beam from a copy of "The Sun Also Rises." Tully
smiles at them.

ABIGAIL
What are you doing?

TULLY
Relaxing. Taking a little sun.

ABIGAIL
Have you gone mad?

TULLY
Au contraire.

Tully closes the book and smugly unfurls a LEGAL DOCUMENT.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 88.

119 EXT. SWAMP - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT 119

Thing hops lily pads, stopping occasionally to quest the
air for his mistress.

CUT TO:

120 EXT. PRIMEVAL FOREST ADJACENT TO CEMETERY - MIDDLE OF 120
THE NIGHT

Torch aloft, Pugsley searches through the primeval forest.

CUT TO:

121 EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT 121

Lurch picks up a car -- looking for Wednesday.

CUT TO:

122 EXT. UNDERGROUND GROTTO - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT 122

Morticia and Granny stand in the middle of the dripping
dankness. Stalagmites. Stalactites.

Granny's torch casts scary shadows on the cave walls.

GRANNY
(calling out)
Wednesday! Wednesday!

MORTICIA
Oh, Mama, I was sure we'd find her
here.

CUT TO:

123 EXT. CEMETERY - DARK 123

Gomez reaches a stately mausoleum at the far end of the
cemetery. Two proud marble vultures guard the entryway.
Gomez lowers the uplifted claw of one of the vultures and
the stone doors slide open. He steps into -

A124 INT. MAUSOLEUM - SAME TIME A124

Inside it is catacomb-like, filled with the bleached
bones of the Addams dead. Gomez's torch casts shadows
-- one of which belongs to Wednesday, curled asleep on a
stone sarcophagus. Relieved to find her, Gomez
approaches quietly. He doesn't want to wake her up. He
lifts her tenderly in his arms.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 89.
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In a frantic search for Wednesday, Gomez organizes the Addams family to look in various eerie locations around their property, including a swamp and cemetery. Morticia expresses her worries, while Granny uses a divining rod. The family splits up, with Pugsley checking the dung heap and Lurch searching the bottomless pit. Meanwhile, Fester and Abigail look for Tully, who is found relaxing in the den. The scene culminates with Gomez discovering Wednesday asleep in a mausoleum, alleviating the family's concerns.
Strengths
  • Strong character interactions
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Engaging concept
Weaknesses
  • Minimal character development
  • Low emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends humor, mystery, and character development, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Addams family searching for Wednesday in their own unique ways is engaging and fits well within the overall tone of the screenplay.

Plot: 7

The plot of searching for Wednesday adds suspense and intrigue to the scene, driving the action forward.

Originality: 8

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to familiar themes, such as a family search with supernatural elements. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions add depth to the scene, showcasing their individual quirks and relationships.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in this scene, as the focus is more on showcasing the characters' personalities and dynamics.

Internal Goal: 9

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to find Wednesday and ensure her safety. This reflects his deep love and protectiveness towards his family, especially his daughter.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to search for Wednesday in different areas of the yard. This reflects the immediate challenge of locating his missing daughter.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a moderate level of conflict as the family searches for Wednesday, but it is mostly lighthearted and comedic.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene, such as the challenge of finding Wednesday in different locations, adds tension and uncertainty to the search. The audience is unsure of the outcome.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, as the main goal is to find Wednesday and bring her back safely.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new conflict and setting up the next plot development.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in terms of the family's search locations and the unexpected twists in their search for Wednesday. The audience is kept on their toes.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between the family's unconventional values and the societal norms of safety and normalcy. This challenges the Addams family's beliefs and lifestyle.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene has a moderate emotional impact, with moments of humor and warmth between the characters.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is witty and humorous, capturing the unique voices of each character.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its suspenseful search for Wednesday, quirky character interactions, and dark humor. The audience is invested in the outcome of the search.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of suspenseful moments and character interactions. The rhythm of the scene contributes to its effectiveness.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions. The formatting enhances the visual storytelling.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character actions and dialogue. It effectively builds tension and suspense as the family searches for Wednesday.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the chaotic and whimsical nature of the Addams Family, showcasing their unique dynamics and dark humor. However, the dialogue could benefit from sharper wit and more distinct character voices to enhance the comedic elements.
  • The structure of the scene is clear, with a logical progression of actions as the family splits up to search for Wednesday. However, the pacing feels a bit rushed, particularly in the transitions between characters. More time spent on each character's search could allow for additional humor and character development.
  • Fester's suggestion to stay behind is a clever touch, but it could be expanded to show more of his personality. This moment could serve as an opportunity to highlight his quirky nature or insecurities, making him more relatable and adding depth to his character.
  • The use of visual elements, such as the ancient map and the various search locations, is a strong point. However, the scene could benefit from more vivid descriptions of the settings to enhance the atmosphere and immerse the audience in the Addams' world.
  • The dialogue between Gomez and the family members is functional but lacks the punchiness that is characteristic of the Addams Family. Incorporating more playful banter or absurdity could elevate the humor and make the interactions feel more authentic to the family's eccentricity.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more character-specific dialogue that reflects their unique personalities. For example, Granny could make a humorous comment about her divining rod, or Pugsley could express excitement about searching the dung heap.
  • Slow down the pacing by including brief moments of humor or character reflection during the search. For instance, as each character searches, they could encounter something absurd or unexpected that highlights their quirks.
  • Expand on Fester's character by giving him a humorous or poignant line when he suggests staying behind. This could provide insight into his feelings about the family dynamics or his relationship with Wednesday.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the settings to create a more immersive experience. For example, describe the eerie ambiance of the swamp or the foreboding nature of the primeval forest to heighten the tension and humor.
  • Incorporate a running gag or motif throughout the scene, such as each character misinterpreting their search area in a humorous way, to create a cohesive comedic thread that ties the scene together.



Scene 48 -  Locked Out: The Addams Family's Legal Woes
124 EXT. GATE - DARKNESS BEFORE DAWN 124

Gate can't open. He rattles miserably on his hinges --
locked tight with heavy chains and yellow police tape -
large "NO TRESPASSING!! COURT ORDER!! ADDAMS FAMILY -
KEEP OUT!!" signs are posted on Gate's rusty bars.

PULL BACK TO REVEAL --

the family, appalled at the sight of Gate. Lurch carries
the sleeping Wednesday and Pugsley.

GOMEZ
What's all this?

TULLY --

hurries down the walkway, waving his legal document.

TULLY
This is a restraining order, Gomez.

GOMEZ
A restraining order?

TULLY
It requires you to keep a distance of
one thousand yards from this house.
You've got about nine hundred and
ninety-nine yards to go - catch my
drift?

GOMEZ
(in disbelief)
I am restrained - from my own house!?

TULLY
Not your house, moustache! Not any
more! It belongs to the eldest living
descendant, the older of the brothers
-- Fester Addams!

GOMEZ
But - this is lunacy!

MORTICIA
Fester adores Gomez!

TULLY
He's afraid of him. Seeing the
twins brought it all back.
(to Gomez)
You're bitter rivals, Gomez - always
were, always will be!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 89A.

124 CONTINUED: 124

GOMEZ
It's not so! Those girls meant nothing
- he knows that! I demand to see
Fester!

TULLY
Sorry - no can do. He's very hurt -
it's not a good time. Leave it alone.
Or better yet - just leave.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/22/91 90.

124 CONTINUED: 124

Wednesday comes forward, rubbing the sleep from her eyes.

WEDNESDAY
But he isn't even Uncle Fester.

Gomez and Morticia turn to look at her.

GOMEZ
(to his family)
Do not fear - justic shall
prevail. The courts will decide!
(fervently)
They say a man who represents
himself has a fool for a client.
Well, with God as my witness -
I am that fool!

CUT TO:

125 OMITTED 125

A126 OMITTED A126


126 INT. COURTROOM - DAY 126

C.U. GAVEL --

hammers on the Judge's bench.

PULL BACK to reveal --

JUDGE WOMACK

is the presiding judge. He hammers the bench again, then
reads his decision.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/26/91 91.

126 CONTINUED: 126

JUDGE WOMACK
Given applicable standards of
proof, the attempts to impugn this
man's character or question his
identity have been woefully
inadequate. It is with no small
amount of personal satisfaction
that I declare Fester Addams legal
executor of the Addams estate and
rightful owner of all properties
and possessions contained herein.
Gomez Addams...
(He holds up a golf ball)
I believe this is yours.

CUT TO:

127 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION - DAY 127

The family members TROOP to the car with their few
possessions.

GOMEZ

already sits in the passenger seat of the Duesenberg, his
coat draped over his shoulders as if he were an invalid,
his head thrown back.

Morticia carries out Cleo, her carnivorous plant. Granny
carries her favorite cauldron, Wednesday one of her Marie
Antoinette dolls, Pugsley his chemistry set. Lurch uproots
his favorite tree and joins the procession. Thing follows,
dragging a toy wagon packed with his rings, his glove.

CUT TO:

128 OMITTED 128

129 EXT. ADDAMS OVERGROWN DRIVEWAY - LATER 129

The Duesenberg eases out of the driveway and onto the
street, WEIGHED DOWN by Lurch's tree, sticking out of
the trunk.

FESTER

standing at a second story window, watches the car drive
off.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 92.
Genres: ["Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary The Addams family faces a locked gate and a restraining order that prevents Gomez from accessing their home. Legal representative Tully informs Gomez that the house now belongs to Fester Addams, and Gomez must maintain a distance of one thousand yards. Despite Morticia's support and Wednesday's skepticism about Fester's legitimacy, Gomez vows to fight for justice in court, setting the stage for a legal battle.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Unique concept
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Humorous elements
Weaknesses
  • Some elements may be too absurd for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, engaging, and introduces a new conflict that adds depth to the story. The absurdity and humor keep the audience entertained.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the Addams family facing a legal battle over ownership of their home is unique and adds an interesting twist to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene is engaging and moves the story forward by introducing a new conflict and setting up future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a dysfunctional family in a gothic setting, with a blend of humor and drama. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and true to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their interactions add depth to the scene. The dynamics between Gomez, Morticia, Fester, and Tully are particularly engaging.

Character Changes: 7

The characters, particularly Fester and Gomez, undergo some changes in their dynamics and motivations, setting up future developments.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to prove his love for his family and his rightful place in the Addams family. He wants to show that he is not a rival to Fester and that justice will prevail.

External Goal: 7

Gomez's external goal is to regain ownership of the Addams estate and possessions, which are now in Fester's hands. He wants to challenge the court's decision and prove his identity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is high, with the Addams family facing a legal battle that threatens their ownership of their home.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong, with legal obstacles and family conflicts creating tension and uncertainty. The audience is left wondering how Gomez will overcome these challenges.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene, as the Addams family faces the possibility of losing their home and ownership.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing a new conflict and setting up future events.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected court decision and the family's reaction to it. The audience is left unsure of how the conflict will be resolved.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between loyalty to family and the legal system. Gomez's love for his family clashes with the court's decision to give ownership to Fester, creating a tension between personal relationships and legal obligations.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from confusion to disbelief to resignation, adding depth to the characters and story.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and effectively conveys the characters' personalities and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the conflict between characters, the witty dialogue, and the dramatic stakes involved. It keeps the audience invested in the outcome and sets up future developments.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and maintaining the audience's interest. It moves at a steady pace, with moments of drama and humor interspersed throughout.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with proper scene headings and descriptions. It adheres to the expected format for a screenplay in this genre.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for a dramatic confrontation, with clear dialogue and character interactions. It builds tension and sets up the conflict for future scenes.


Critique
  • The scene effectively establishes a sense of conflict and tension with the introduction of the restraining order, which is a strong plot device that raises the stakes for Gomez and the family. However, the dialogue could be tightened to enhance the urgency and emotional weight of the situation. For instance, Tully's lines could be more concise to convey his authority without dragging the pace.
  • Gomez's disbelief and determination are well portrayed, but his emotional arc could be deepened. Instead of merely stating his disbelief, he could express a more visceral reaction to the absurdity of being restrained from his own home, which would resonate more with the audience.
  • Wednesday's line about Fester not being their uncle is a clever twist that adds a layer of intrigue, but it feels somewhat abrupt. It could be more impactful if it were set up with a bit more context or emotion, perhaps reflecting her own skepticism about Fester's identity.
  • The scene's pacing is uneven; while the initial setup is strong, the dialogue exchange between Tully and Gomez could benefit from a more dynamic rhythm. Consider incorporating interruptions or overlapping dialogue to create a more chaotic atmosphere that reflects the family's distress.
  • The visual description of the gate and the police tape is effective in setting the scene, but it could be enhanced with more sensory details. For example, describing the sounds of the chains rattling or the eerie silence of the early morning could heighten the tension and atmosphere.
Suggestions
  • Revise Tully's dialogue to be more succinct, focusing on the key points of the restraining order without excessive exposition. This will help maintain the scene's momentum.
  • Add a moment where Gomez physically reacts to the news of the restraining order, such as a gesture or facial expression that conveys his disbelief and frustration more vividly.
  • Consider expanding Wednesday's line to include a brief reflection on her feelings about Fester, which would add depth to her character and the overall family dynamic.
  • Experiment with the pacing of the dialogue by incorporating interruptions or rapid exchanges to create a sense of urgency and chaos, reflecting the family's emotional state.
  • Enhance the sensory details in the scene by describing the atmosphere more vividly, including sounds, smells, and the overall mood of the early morning setting.



Scene 49 -  Despair in the Bungalow
130 EXT. WAMPUM COURT - LATER. 130

A two-story NEON ARROW points the way to this bungalow
court -- Bright and awful ersatz western. LOG CABINS OF
SIMULATED WOOD surround the TEEPEE-SHAPED OFFICE.

The Addams' Duesenberg is parked in front of the furthest
cabin. The asphalt has been ripped up in big chunks and
Lurch's tree is parked next to the Addams' new home.

CUT TO:
131 INT. BUNGALOW - SAME TIME 131

C.U. DRESSING TABLE MIRROR

Morticia leans into frame. With an icepick and a hammer,
she deftly makes a large spidery CRACK in the round mirror.
Sighing deeply, she stands back to admire her handiwork.
Granny joins her.

GRANNY
I like it.

Her mother pats her consolingly.

MORTICIA
Just as long as we're together,
n'est pas, mon cher?

As she turns to Gomez, we see the interior of the bungalow
-- all ersatz cowboy and Indian mixed with chrome-plated
plastic and orange shag carpet.

GOMEZ

sits slumped in a chair made from wagon wheel and nauga-
hyde. It's as if all of his insane, vibrant energy has
been leeched from him. He's a broken man. He looks back
at her as if he's never heard French.

GOMEZ
Huh?

Wednesday tends to him. She and her mother exchange a
worried look.

PUGSLEY

comes from the bathroom, nibbling a wrapped bar of motel
soap.

PUGSLEY
This place isn't so bad. They even
put candy in the bathroom.

MORTICIA
That's the soap, dear.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 93.

131 CONTINUED: 131

PUGSLEY
Oh.

He takes another greedy bite.

Wednesday pats her father's arm.

WEDNESDAY
Do you want a cigar, Father?

GOMEZ
(in a monotone)
They're very bad for you.

WEDNESDAY
(very worried)
Father?

Wednesday exchanges a panic-stricken look with Morticia.
The family moves closer to Gomez.

GOMEZ
But maybe I'll have one of those...

He takes a bar of soap from Pugsley. Gomez unwraps it
and morosely eats.

CUT TO:

132 OMITTED 132

132A INT. ADDAMS MANSION - MIDWAY TO THE VAULT 132A

C.U. on three hands, as they reach up to pull three of
the countless chains.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a kitschy bungalow court, the Addams family grapples with Gomez's deep despondency. Morticia tries to connect with him while expressing her love for the family, but he remains unresponsive. Pugsley innocently mistakes soap for candy, adding a humorous touch, while Wednesday shows concern for her father's health, even offering him a cigar. The scene culminates in Gomez eating a bar of soap, symbolizing his emotional turmoil and the family's unwavering support amidst their darkly humorous circumstances.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Emotional depth
  • Effective use of contrast
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Limited action

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys a sense of unease and melancholy through the contrast between the Addams family's usual gothic environment and the garish motel setting. The dialogue and character interactions add depth to the scene, showcasing the family's bond and concern for each other.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of placing the Addams family in a jarring, artificial setting adds depth to their characters and explores themes of identity and belonging. The scene effectively uses contrast to highlight the family's unique qualities.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in the scene focuses on the emotional state of the Addams family in a new and challenging environment. While there is not much action, the character dynamics and dialogue drive the narrative forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh and original take on the Addams Family characters, placing them in a bizarre and unconventional setting that highlights their eccentricities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, showcasing vulnerability, concern, and resilience in the face of adversity. The interactions between family members reveal their deep bond and unique personalities.

Character Changes: 7

The characters show vulnerability and resilience in the face of adversity, highlighting their growth and adaptability. The scene deepens the audience's understanding of the Addams family dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain a sense of togetherness and family unity in the face of their new surroundings and challenges. This reflects their deeper need for connection and stability.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to adapt to their new living situation and make the best of it, despite the unconventional environment.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

The conflict in the scene is more internal and emotional, focusing on the Addams family's struggle to adapt to a new environment and maintain their unity. While there is tension, it is subtle and character-driven.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is moderate, with the characters facing challenges in their new environment but ultimately finding ways to adapt and overcome them.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are emotional and internal, focusing on the Addams family's unity and resilience in a challenging situation. While there is tension, the scene emphasizes character development and relationships.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by exploring the emotional state of the Addams family in a new environment. While there is not much action, the character interactions and dialogue drive the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected actions and dialogue of the characters, adding an element of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict revolves around the clash between the Addams' unconventional lifestyle and the mundane world they find themselves in. This challenges their beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene has a strong emotional impact, conveying the vulnerability and resilience of the Addams family in a challenging situation. The characters' worries and concerns evoke empathy from the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotional tone of the scene, highlighting the family's concern for each other and their resilience in a challenging situation. The conversations add depth to the characters and drive the narrative forward.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its quirky setting, dark humor, and character interactions that keep the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene enhances its comedic timing and character interactions, keeping the audience engaged and entertained.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedy screenplay, with clear character dynamics and comedic beats.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the Addams family's signature dark humor and quirky charm, particularly through Morticia's interaction with the mirror and Pugsley's misunderstanding of soap as candy. However, the tone shifts dramatically from the previous scene's whimsical chaos to a more somber atmosphere, which may confuse the audience. This transition could benefit from a stronger connective thread to maintain narrative flow.
  • Gomez's characterization as a 'broken man' is compelling, but the scene could delve deeper into the emotional weight of his despair. While the dialogue hints at his state, visual cues and more expressive actions could enhance the audience's understanding of his emotional turmoil. For instance, showing him engaging in a futile activity or staring blankly at an object could visually represent his despondency.
  • The dialogue is witty and captures the essence of the characters, but it feels somewhat disjointed. The exchange between Morticia and Granny is sweet, yet it lacks a clear purpose in advancing the plot or deepening character relationships. Consider integrating more subtext or conflict in their dialogue to enrich the scene.
  • Wednesday's concern for Gomez is a nice touch, but it could be more pronounced. Her character is typically more assertive and darkly humorous; allowing her to express her worry in a more unique way could add depth to her character while maintaining the overall tone. For example, she could suggest a more macabre remedy for Gomez's state.
  • Pugsley's innocent misunderstanding of the soap is humorous, but it could be expanded to include a more interactive moment with the family. Perhaps he could offer the soap to Gomez as a 'treat,' prompting a more dynamic family interaction that showcases their unique bond.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Gomez that visually illustrates his emotional state, such as him staring at a family photo or a memento from their past, which could evoke nostalgia and deepen the audience's empathy.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Morticia and Granny by introducing a playful argument or a shared memory that highlights their bond while also reflecting on the current situation, thus adding layers to their characters.
  • Incorporate more physical comedy or visual gags that align with the Addams family's eccentricity, such as Morticia accidentally breaking more items in the bungalow, which could serve as a metaphor for their current disarray.
  • Explore Wednesday's character further by allowing her to suggest a darkly humorous solution to Gomez's despair, showcasing her unique perspective and adding to the scene's comedic tone.
  • Consider ending the scene with a more impactful visual or line that encapsulates the family's resilience despite their circumstances, perhaps with Gomez making a darkly humorous remark as he eats the soap, reinforcing the Addams family's ability to find humor in despair.



Scene 50 -  Resilience in the Addams Family
A133 EXT. ADDAMS YARD - MIDNIGHT A133

THE COAL CHUTE ON THE SIDE OF THE HOUSE --

drops open, dumping out Fester, Abigail, and Tully - all
of them wet and bedraggled and gasping for air.

ABIGAIL
(to Fester)
You're doing this on purpose.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 94.

A133 CONTINUED: A133

They all struggle to their feet and march grimly back
toward the door.

CUT TO:

133 INT. WAMPUM COURT BUNGALOW - MORNING 133

Gomez is STRETCHED OUT on the naked box springs of his
bed -- the mattress pushed aside. A damp cloth covers
his eyes. Thing MASSAGES his aching head. A bowl of
MOTEL SOAPS is beside him.

In contrast, Morticia squarely faces the crisis. She
addresses the family from the head of the breakfast
table, the want ads open on the table before her.

MORTICIA
We are Addamses, and we will not
submit. Who recalls the fable of
the tortoise and the hare? The
swift, yet lazy little cottontail,
and his slow but determined companion?
What does that story teach us, as
Addamses?

GRANNY
Kill the hare. Skin it. Boil it.

WEDNESDAY
Put the tortoise on the highway.

PUGSLEY
During rush hour.

MORTICIA
Yes! We will survive! Poison us,
strangle us, break our bones -
we will come back for more.
And why?

GRANNY
Because we like it!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/12/90 94A.

133 CONTINUED: 133

PUGSLEY
Because we're Addamses!

Gomez tries to rouse himself.

GOMEZ
(out of it)
We're Addamses...

He burps -- soap bubbles floating from his mouth.

CUT TO:

134 OMMITTED 134

135 OMITTED 135
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/28/90 95.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary The scene begins with Fester, Abigail, and Tully emerging from a coal chute after a chaotic escape, struggling to regain their composure. The next morning, Gomez is found disheveled in bed while Thing massages his head. Morticia inspires the family with a motivational speech about resilience, referencing the fable of the tortoise and the hare. The family responds with dark humor, affirming their identity as Addamses. Gomez, still groggy, humorously echoes their sentiments while burping soap bubbles, highlighting the blend of humor and unity in the face of adversity.
Strengths
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Character dynamics
  • Resilience of the Addams family
Weaknesses
  • Low emotional impact
  • Minimal character change

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, dark comedy, and family dynamics to create an entertaining and engaging moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Addams family facing a crisis with their trademark dark humor and resilience is well-executed. The scene effectively showcases the family's unique identity and values.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the Addams family dealing with a crisis in a humorous and unconventional way. While it may not significantly advance the main plot, it adds depth to the characters and their relationships.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a quirky and macabre family facing a crisis with dark humor and resilience. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to their eccentric personalities.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene, especially Morticia, Gomez, and the rest of the Addams family, are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric and darkly humorous personas. Each character contributes to the scene's tone and humor.

Character Changes: 5

There is minimal character change in the scene, as the Addams family members remain true to their eccentric and resilient selves. The focus is more on showcasing their unique personalities.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to rally the Addams family together in the face of a crisis. Morticia aims to instill a sense of resilience and defiance in her family members.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to strategize and plan a way to overcome the crisis they are facing. Morticia is focused on finding a solution to the problem at hand.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is a conflict in the form of the Addams family facing a crisis, the tone remains light and humorous, reducing the sense of tension. The conflict serves more as a comedic device than a source of high stakes.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and challenge the characters, but not overwhelming to the point of overshadowing their resilience and humor.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, as the Addams family faces a humorous crisis that does not pose a serious threat. The focus is more on showcasing the family's resilience and humor.

Story Forward: 6

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a crisis for the Addams family to overcome, but it does not significantly advance the main plot. Instead, it adds depth to the characters and their relationships.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' unconventional responses to the crisis and the dark humor that infuses their dialogue.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams family's unique values and beliefs, such as embracing darkness, morbidity, and resilience in the face of adversity. Morticia's speech highlights these conflicting values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits amusement and mild concern from the audience, but the emotional impact is not deeply profound. The focus is more on humor and character dynamics.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, sarcastic, and darkly humorous, reflecting the unique personalities of the Addams family members. The lines effectively convey the family's resilience and identity.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dark humor, quirky characters, and unpredictable solutions to problems. The dialogue and actions keep the audience intrigued and entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and humor, with a balance of dialogue and action that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a setup, conflict, and resolution that align with the Addams family's eccentric nature.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the Addams family's dark humor and resilience, showcasing their unique perspective on adversity. Morticia's motivational speech is a strong focal point, emphasizing the family's determination to endure challenges, which aligns well with the Addams ethos.
  • The dialogue is sharp and witty, particularly the exchanges between Morticia, Granny, Wednesday, and Pugsley. Each character's response adds to the comedic tone while reinforcing their distinct personalities. However, the humor could be enhanced by varying the pacing and rhythm of the dialogue to create more dynamic interactions.
  • Gomez's state of disarray serves as a humorous contrast to Morticia's composed leadership. However, his character feels somewhat passive in this scene. It would be beneficial to give him a more active role in the conversation or to have him contribute a humorous quip that reflects his usual charm, even in his groggy state.
  • The visual elements, such as Gomez on the box springs and Thing massaging his head, are effective in establishing the scene's tone. However, the transition from the coal chute to the breakfast table could be smoother. Consider adding a brief moment that connects the two settings, perhaps showing the aftermath of their chaotic escape before cutting to the calm of the breakfast scene.
  • The scene ends on a humorous note with Gomez burping soap bubbles, which is fitting for the Addams family. However, it might benefit from a stronger closing line or action that ties back to Morticia's speech, reinforcing the theme of resilience and unity among the family members.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of physical comedy or interaction between Gomez and Thing to highlight their relationship and provide a visual gag that contrasts with Morticia's serious tone.
  • Enhance the pacing of the dialogue by incorporating pauses or interruptions, allowing characters to react to each other in real-time, which can heighten the comedic effect.
  • Give Gomez a more active role in the scene, perhaps by having him attempt to contribute to Morticia's speech or make a humorous comment about their situation, even in his groggy state.
  • Smooth the transition between the coal chute and the breakfast table by including a visual or auditory cue that connects the chaos of their escape to the calmness of the breakfast scene, such as the sound of the door slamming shut behind them.
  • Consider adding a final line or action that reinforces the theme of resilience, such as a family toast or a shared mantra that encapsulates their determination to face challenges together.



Scene 51 -  Lemonade Gone Wrong
136 EXT. SIDEWALK IN FRONT OF THE WAMPUM COURT - DAY 136

Wednesday and Pugsley have set up a LEMONADE STAND, their
contribution to the Addams' financial well-being. An
array of POISONS are lined up on their rickety table.
They've slashed their prices to a nickel per cup. The
pitcher on the table before them steams.

Cars speed by.

Carrying a SAMPLE VACUUM CLEANER and a bucket, Lurch comes
out of the motel courtyard. Pugsley offers him a cup of
punch.

PUGSLEY
Here, Lurch. On the house.

Lurch downs it in a gulp and heads off.

Feeling the effects of the lemonade, Lurch BURPS -- a
tongue of flame shoots from his mouth and INCINERATES A
WOODEN INDIAN advertising the Wampum Court.

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137 OMITTED 137

138 INT. EMPLOYMENT AGENCY 138

Morticia is being interviewed by a PERSONNEL OFFICER, a
relentlessly perky gal with a clipboard.

PERSONNEL OFFICER
We have so many homemakers re-entering
the work force - your domestic skills
can be very valuable. College?

MORTICIA
Private tutors.

PERSONNEL OFFICER
Major?

MORTICIA
Spells and Hexes.

PERSONNEL OFFICER
(knowingly)
Liberal Arts. Have you been a
volunteer, PTA, service organizations?

MORTICIA
Well, one day each week I visit Death
Row at our local prison, with my
children.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 96.

138 CONTINUED: 138

PERSONNEL OFFICER
(perplexed)
With your children?

MORTICIA
Autographs.

PERSONNEL OFFICER
Well, what about your husband? Is
he currently employed?

MORTICIA
He's... he's going through a bad patch
at the moment. But it's not his fault.

PERSONNEL OFFICER
(with some bitterness)
Of course not. What is he - A
loafer? A hopeless layabout? A
shiftless dreamer?

MORTICIA
(wistfully)
Not anymore.

The Personnel Officer shoots Morticia a doubtful glance,
and begins rifling through her card file.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy"]

Summary Wednesday and Pugsley run a lemonade stand outside the Wampum Court, selling a toxic mix disguised as lemonade. When Lurch stops by and drinks a cup, he burps fire, accidentally setting a wooden Indian on fire. The scene blends dark humor with chaos as Lurch leaves behind the charred remains, highlighting the absurdity of their lemonade venture.
Strengths
  • Dark humor
  • Sarcastic dialogue
  • Character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Low stakes
  • Limited plot progression

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, satire, and character dynamics to create an entertaining and memorable moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the scene, focusing on the Addams family's unique approach to everyday situations, is strong and engaging.

Plot: 7

While the scene doesn't heavily impact the main plot, it adds depth to the characters and provides a humorous interlude in the story.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of a lemonade stand selling poisons and Morticia's unconventional job interview responses, adding fresh and unexpected elements to the story.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters shine in this scene, with Morticia's deadpan humor, Pugsley and Wednesday's mischievousness, and Lurch's unexpected reaction adding layers to their personalities.

Character Changes: 4

There are subtle shifts in character dynamics, especially in Morticia's job interview, but no significant changes occur.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain the Addams family's financial well-being by selling lemonade, showcasing their resourcefulness and commitment to their unconventional lifestyle.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to sell lemonade and make money to support their family, reflecting their immediate need for financial stability.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there is some conflict in the scene, particularly in Morticia's job interview, it is more lighthearted and serves to highlight the characters' quirks.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and humor, especially in Morticia's job interview.

High Stakes: 3

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and character interactions than on high-stakes drama.

Story Forward: 6

The scene provides insight into the Addams family's financial situation and Morticia's attempt to find a job, adding depth to the story.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected events, such as Lurch's fiery burp, that add a sense of surprise and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict revolves around societal norms and the Addams family's rejection of conventional values, as seen in Morticia's unconventional responses during the job interview.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene elicits humor and amusement from the audience, but the emotional impact is not the primary focus.

Dialogue: 8

The witty and sarcastic dialogue enhances the humor and satirical elements of the scene, showcasing the unique voices of the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its dark humor, quirky characters, and unexpected situations that keep the audience entertained.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building comedic tension and delivering punchlines at the right moments.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with proper scene headings and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedy screenplay, with clear character interactions and comedic beats.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the juxtaposition of a lemonade stand with poisons. This absurdity aligns well with the family's quirky nature, but it could benefit from a stronger setup to enhance the comedic payoff.
  • Lurch's reaction to the lemonade is a humorous highlight, but the visual of him burping fire could be more impactful if it were foreshadowed or built up with a more elaborate setup. For instance, showing Lurch's hesitation or curiosity before drinking could add tension and anticipation.
  • The dialogue is minimal, which works for the scene's pacing, but adding a few more lines between Wednesday and Pugsley could deepen their characters and provide insight into their motivations for setting up the stand. This could also enhance the comedic element by showcasing their banter.
  • The transition to the next scene feels abrupt. While the cut to the employment agency is a clever shift, it might benefit from a brief moment that ties the two scenes together, perhaps a visual cue or a line that connects the financial struggles of the family to Morticia's job search.
  • The scene's setting is clear, but it could be enriched with more sensory details. Describing the smell of the lemonade or the sounds of the bustling street could create a more immersive experience for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief exchange between Wednesday and Pugsley that highlights their motivations for selling lemonade, perhaps discussing their financial goals or the reactions they expect from customers.
  • Enhance Lurch's moment by including a visual gag or a reaction shot from passing cars or pedestrians, which could amplify the humor of the situation and provide a broader context for the Addams family's antics.
  • Introduce a comedic element where a customer approaches the stand, leading to a humorous interaction that showcases the dangers of their lemonade, before Lurch drinks it. This could build tension and enhance the absurdity of the situation.
  • To improve the transition to the employment agency scene, consider adding a line or visual cue that connects the family's financial struggles to Morticia's job search, reinforcing the theme of resilience in the face of adversity.
  • Incorporate more sensory details to enrich the scene, such as the sound of the lemonade bubbling or the sight of the steaming pitcher, to create a more vivid and engaging atmosphere.



Scene 52 -  Vacation Plans and Lemonade Shenanigans
139 INT. ADDAMS LIVING ROOM - DAY 139

Abigail and Fester are seated at opposite ends of the
couch. Fester stares off into space. Abigail is going
through a stack of colorful travel brochures.

ABIGAIL
The Mediterranean, the Riviera - once
we find the money, we'll go everywhere.
We'll try again, right after lunch.
Gordon - where should we go first?

FESTER
(sadly)
I don't know...

ABIGAIL
Acapulco? Cancun?
(she snaps her fingers
in the air, castanet-
style, trying to be
festive)
Ariba! Ariba!

FESTER
You choose.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 A96A.

A140 EXT. WAMPUM COURT - LATER THAT DAY A140

Wednesday and Pugsley are at their lemonade stand. They
are negotiating with a PRISSY LITTLE GIRL IN A GIRL SCOUT
UNIFORM. The girl scout carries several boxes of Girl
Scout cookies.

GIRL SCOUT
(with grave doubts)
Is this made from real lemons?

WEDNESDAY
Yes.

GIRL SCOUT
I only like all-natural foods and
beverages. Organically grown, with
no preservatives. Are you sure
they're real lemons?

PUGSLEY
Yes.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/26/91 96A.

A140 CONTINUED: A140

GIRL SCOUT
Well... I tell you what. I'll buy
a cup, if you buy a box of my
delicious girl scout cookies. Do
we have a deal?

WEDNESDAY
Are they made from real girl scouts?

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140 EXT. SUBURBAN HOUSE - DAY 140

White clapboard. Geraniums in the flower boxes.
Surrounded by a white picket fence.

Carrying his SAMPLE VACUUM CLEANER AND BUCKET, the tools of
his new trade, Lurch carefully opens the little white gate.

AT THE DOOR,

he rings the doorbell, afraid he might break something.

A BLONDE HOUSEWIFE in tennis whites, obviously in a hurry,
opens the door -- only to be greeted by a BUCKETFUL OF
SLOP thrown past her, onto her peach Oriental rug. She
SCREAMS in horror, turns to challenge the perpetrator of
this atrocity and, seeing Lurch, SCREAMS again.

In a panic, she tries to slam the door on Lurch, but, like
the salesman's manual undoubtedly advised, he STICKS his
foot in the way. The door partially RIPS off its hinges.

Lurch steps inside and shuts the door as best he can.

A moment passes. The door swings open and Lurch exits,
jauntily waving a check.

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141 OMITTED 141

142 OMITTED 142
& &
143 143

A144 OMITTED A144

B144 OMITTED B144
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/22/91 97.

144 INT. DAYCARE CENTER - DAY 144

Morticia is telling a story to a group of TODDLERS, who
have gathered in a circle around her, sitting on carpet
squares. The room is sunny and cheerful, with crayon
drawings taped to the walls.

MORTICIA
... and so the witch lured Hansel
and Gretel into the candy house,
by promising them more sweets. And
she told them to look in the oven,
and she was about to push them in,
when, low and behold, Hansel pushed
the poor, defenseless witch into the
oven instead. Where she was burned
alive, writhing in agony. Now,
boys and girls, what do you think
that feels like?

After a beat, all the toddlers begin to CRY and WAIL.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 98.

145 OMITTED 145
thru thru
147 147

148 OMITTED 148
thru thru
152 OMITTED 152
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In the Addams living room, Abigail tries to cheer up the melancholic Fester by suggesting vacation spots, but he remains disinterested. Meanwhile, Wednesday and Pugsley run a lemonade stand, humorously negotiating with a skeptical Girl Scout about their product's authenticity. Lurch attempts to sell a vacuum cleaner but inadvertently creates chaos in a suburban home, leaving with a check despite the frightened housewife. The scene concludes with Morticia telling a dark story to toddlers at a daycare, causing them to cry, showcasing the family's signature blend of dark humor and absurdity.
Strengths
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Dark humor
  • Quirky dialogue
  • Engaging interactions
Weaknesses
  • Low emotional depth
  • Limited character growth

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams Family with its dark humor, quirky dialogue, and eccentric characters. It maintains a consistent tone and advances the plot while providing entertaining interactions.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of bringing the Addams Family into a suburban setting and exploring their interactions with outsiders adds a fresh twist to the familiar characters. The scene effectively blends dark humor with everyday situations.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around the family's interactions with neighbors and their unique way of handling everyday situations. It sets up conflicts and hints at future developments, keeping the audience intrigued.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its dark humor and unique character interactions, providing fresh and unexpected moments.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-defined and stay true to their established personalities from the original Addams Family series. Each character contributes to the humor and dynamics of the scene.

Character Changes: 6

There are subtle hints of character growth and development, especially in Fester's interactions with Abigail and the family. However, the changes are not significant in this particular scene.

Internal Goal: 8

Abigail's internal goal is to find a way to bring joy and excitement into Fester's life, despite his sadness and lack of direction.

External Goal: 7

Abigail's external goal is to plan a trip and find a way to bring happiness and adventure into their lives.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there are conflicts present in the scene, they are mostly light-hearted and serve to create comedic situations rather than intense drama.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals and motivations between the characters, creating tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes in the scene are relatively low, focusing more on comedic situations and character interactions rather than high-stakes drama.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, setting up future events, and deepening the relationships between characters. It keeps the narrative engaging and sets the stage for further developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the character interactions and dialogue.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict between Abigail's optimism and Fester's pessimism, highlighting their differing outlooks on life and the future.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 5

The scene focuses more on humor and wit rather than emotional depth. The audience is more likely to be entertained and amused rather than emotionally moved.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, sarcastic, and filled with dark humor, reflecting the unique voices of the Addams Family members. It adds depth to the characters and enhances the comedic elements.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its witty dialogue, unique character interactions, and dark humor.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing dialogue and action, keeping the audience engaged and interested.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a comedy screenplay, with clear character motivations and interactions.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the juxtaposition of Fester's melancholy with Abigail's overly enthusiastic vacation plans. However, Fester's sadness could be more deeply explored to enhance emotional resonance. The contrast between their moods is clear, but it feels somewhat superficial without a deeper exploration of Fester's internal conflict.
  • The dialogue between Abigail and Fester is functional but lacks depth. Abigail's attempts to be festive come off as slightly one-dimensional, and Fester's responses could benefit from more nuance. Adding layers to their conversation could help convey Fester's emotional turmoil more effectively.
  • The transition to the lemonade stand scene is abrupt. While it introduces a humorous subplot, it feels disconnected from the emotional weight of Fester's situation. A smoother transition or a thematic link between Fester's despair and the children's antics could create a more cohesive narrative flow.
  • The humor in the lemonade stand scene is strong, particularly with Wednesday's line about the cookies being made from real girl scouts. However, the stakes could be raised further to enhance the comedic impact. For instance, adding a reaction from the Girl Scout that escalates the absurdity could amplify the humor.
  • Lurch's scene with the housewife is classic Addams humor, but it could benefit from a clearer setup to establish the stakes. The chaos is amusing, but the audience might appreciate a bit more context about Lurch's motivations or the consequences of his actions.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Fester reflects on his feelings about the Addams family and his place within it. This could provide a more profound emotional anchor for the scene.
  • Enhance Abigail's character by giving her a more distinct voice or quirks that make her more memorable. This could involve her having a specific catchphrase or a unique way of expressing her enthusiasm.
  • Create a more seamless transition between Fester's scene and the lemonade stand by incorporating a thematic element, such as Fester's longing for normalcy contrasted with the children's chaotic antics.
  • In the lemonade stand scene, consider adding a humorous twist where the Girl Scout tries the lemonade and has an exaggerated reaction, further emphasizing the absurdity of the situation.
  • For Lurch's scene, consider adding a line of dialogue or a thought bubble that reveals his perspective on the chaos, which could enhance the humor and provide insight into his character.



Scene 53 -  A Day of Quirks and Plans
A153 EXT. WAMPUN BUNGALOW - DAY A153

Granny holds a club behind her back as she stalks
something.

GRANNY
Here kitty, kitty, kitty...

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153 INT. WAMPUM BUNGALOW - SAME TIME 153

Eating compulsively form a box of Mallomars, Gomez is
still stretched out on the naked box springs. He stares
vacantly at a game show on TV. "Jeopardy" is on.

ALEX TREBEK
(reading from
the card)
Monsters Of History for $200. "He was
known as the Butcher of Bavaria."

GOMEZ
(shouts)
Grandfather Addams!
(smacks his forehead,
hard)
Damn! Not in the form of a question!

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A154 EXT. BUNGALOW - SAME TIME A154

Granny, running now, club raised, hurries past the open
window of the bungalow.

She stops at the sight of Gomez inside, standing on the
bed, staring at the television.

C.U. on the TV set - Gomez is now watching Geraldo Rivera,
hosting his tabloid style show.

GERALDO
Voodoo zombies - the stuff of
legend, or a living nightmare? Do
zombies really exist? How are they
made? Where can we find them?
Call in with your comments.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 99.

A154 CONTINUED: A154

A CALL-IN NUMBER is flashed on the screen. Gomez reaches
for the phone.

CUT TO:

154 INT. ADDAMS MANSION DINING ROOM - DAY 154

Abigail and Gordon are seated at opposite ends of the
table, having lunch. It is very quiet.

ABIGAIL
After lunch, we'll try again.

FESTER
(very flat)
Yes, Mother.

ABIGAIL
We'll find the money. And meanwhile,
we have this little nest. Quiet and
cozy. Without that dreadful family.

FESTER
Yes, Mother.

ABIGAIL
Just the two of us, away from the
world. Our dream come true.

FESTER
Yes, Mother.

As Fester repeats "Yes, Mother", in his drone, Abigail
mimics him, silently.

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Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy"]

Summary In this comedic scene, Granny is outside the Wampun Bungalow, energetically searching for a cat with a club, while Gomez is lazily indulging in Mallomars and flipping through TV channels, oblivious to the chaos around him. Inside the Addams Mansion, Abigail and Fester share a quiet lunch, discussing their desire to escape the Addams family, with Fester monotonously agreeing to her plans. The contrasting dynamics highlight the absurdity of their situations, blending dark humor with quirky interactions.
Strengths
  • Effective blend of humor and melancholy
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Low stakes
  • Limited action

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor and melancholy, showcasing the quirky nature of the Addams family while hinting at deeper emotional undercurrents.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on the Addams family's unique interactions and eccentricities, is well-executed and engaging.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene moves forward through character interactions and hints at larger conflicts within the family.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its portrayal of quirky characters, dark humor, and unconventional family dynamics. The dialogue and actions feel authentic to the Addams family's eccentricities, adding a fresh approach to familiar themes.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters in the scene are well-developed, showcasing their quirks, relationships, and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 6

There are subtle hints at character growth, particularly in Fester's interactions with Abigail.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to entertain himself and indulge in his eccentricities, as seen through his compulsive eating and shouting out answers to game show questions. This reflects his need for stimulation and excitement in his otherwise mundane life.

External Goal: 7

Gomez's external goal in this scene is to call in to a tabloid-style TV show about voodoo zombies, showcasing his interest in the bizarre and supernatural. This reflects his immediate circumstances of seeking entertainment and connection with the outside world.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a subtle conflict between Fester and Abigail, hinting at deeper emotional tensions within the family.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and tension, with characters like Abigail and Gomez at odds with each other's values and desires. The audience is left wondering how these conflicts will be resolved.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on character interactions and dynamics.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts and deepening existing character dynamics.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions and dialogue of the characters, as well as the blend of supernatural and everyday elements. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is between the Addams family's unconventional values and societal norms. Abigail's desire for a quiet and cozy life away from the 'dreadful family' contrasts with the Addams' love for the macabre and eccentric.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, from humor to sadness, engaging the audience on an emotional level.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the humor, sarcasm, and emotional nuances of the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its quirky characters, witty dialogue, and unpredictable events. The blend of dark humor and supernatural elements keeps the audience entertained and intrigued.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of humor, tension, and character development. The rhythm keeps the audience engaged and invested in the story.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. It is easy to follow and visually engaging.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear transitions between different locations and characters. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through the juxtaposition of Granny's hunting for a cat and Gomez's apathetic state while watching TV. However, the pacing feels uneven, with the transitions between Granny's antics and Gomez's lethargy lacking a smooth flow.
  • Gomez's interaction with the TV show is amusing, but it could benefit from more dynamic dialogue or action. His shout about 'Grandfather Addams' is a nice touch, but it feels isolated. Incorporating more physical comedy or reactions from him could enhance the humor and engagement.
  • The dialogue between Abigail and Fester is intentionally flat, which serves to highlight Fester's emotional state. However, it risks becoming monotonous. Adding subtle variations in Fester's responses or introducing a moment of unexpected humor could break the monotony and add depth to their relationship.
  • The scene lacks a strong visual element that ties the two locations together. While Granny is outside and Gomez is inside, there could be a more pronounced connection between their actions, perhaps through a shared moment or a visual gag that highlights the absurdity of their situations.
  • The cutaways between the two locations feel abrupt. A more gradual transition or a visual motif that links Granny's pursuit and Gomez's TV fixation could create a more cohesive scene. This would help maintain the audience's engagement and enhance the comedic timing.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a physical gag involving Granny's pursuit of the cat that could intersect with Gomez's actions, such as her inadvertently causing chaos inside the bungalow while he remains oblivious.
  • Enhance Gomez's character by giving him a more animated reaction to the TV show, perhaps by having him engage in a humorous debate with the TV host or even attempting to call in with a ridiculous comment.
  • Introduce a moment where Fester breaks his monotone response, perhaps by reacting to something outside or expressing a fleeting desire to reconnect with the Addams family, which could add depth to his character.
  • Use a visual motif, such as a recurring object or sound, to bridge the two locations. For example, the sound of Granny's club hitting something could coincide with a comedic moment in the bungalow, creating a more seamless transition.
  • Consider adding a humorous twist at the end of the scene, such as Granny returning with an unexpected catch (like a bizarre creature instead of a cat) that could serve as a punchline to both her and Gomez's storylines.



Scene 54 -  Gomez's TV Troubles
A155 INT. BUNGALOW - AN HOUR LATER A155

C.U. on the TV screen. Geraldo is talking to a woman in
the studio audience.

GERALDO
So your son was brainwashed by voodoo
slave masters and forced to recruit
others. Let's take a call.

GOMEZ
(on the studio PA system)
Geraldo...

GERALDO
(cutting him off)
Mr. Addams, please stop calling.
We don't know where they meet.
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 100.

A155 CONTINUED: A155

PULL BACK to the motel room. Gomez lets the phone drop.
Morticia, seated on the edge of the box spring, tries to
comfort him. Pugsley, Wednesday and Lurch are seated
nearby, very worried about Gomez, as at a death watch.

Gomez is now surrounded by junk food, and a mountain of
junk food wrappers, bags and styrofoam containers.

Ritually, as handmaidens, Morticia brings Gomez the
remote control for the TV, and Wednesday brings him a
copy of TV Guide.

Pugsley brings Gomez a bag of "Doritos", and Lurch brings
him a canister of "Pringles".

Gomez uses the remote to switch channels. An episode of
"The Cosby Show" comes on.

GOMEZ
Re-run.

He switches off the set and stares at the blank screen.

PUGSLEY
I don't understand. All he does
is watch TV and eat.

MORTICIA
I know - Gomez, let's go for a drive.
The whole family.

GOMEZ
(not even turning)
A drive? And miss "Matlock"?

Granny opens the door and sticks her head in.

GRANNY
Dinner's going to be late.

She slams the door. We hear her whistling.

GRANNY (O.S.)
Here, boy. Here, boy.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/7/91 100A.
Genres: ["Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a motel room, Gomez is distressed after a frustrating phone call with Geraldo about his son being brainwashed. Surrounded by junk food, he declines Morticia's suggestion for a family drive, preferring to watch TV instead. The children express concern, while Morticia and Lurch try to cheer him up with snacks and a remote. The scene highlights Gomez's apathy and the family's quirky dynamics, ending with Granny announcing dinner will be late.
Strengths
  • Humorous dialogue
  • Character interactions
  • Quirky humor
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant plot progression
  • Low stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines humor, dark undertones, and character dynamics to create an engaging and entertaining moment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the scene, focusing on the Addams family's unique dynamics and humor, is well-executed and engaging.

Plot: 7

While the plot doesn't advance significantly in this scene, it adds depth to the characters and sets up potential conflicts and resolutions.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to familiar themes, such as family dynamics and coping with stress. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth and complexity to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions showcase their individual quirks and relationships within the family.

Character Changes: 4

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, it adds depth to the characters' personalities and relationships.

Internal Goal: 8

Gomez's internal goal in this scene is to cope with the stress and anxiety caused by the situation with their son being brainwashed. His actions and dialogue reflect his need for comfort and distraction from the troubling events.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to find a way to deal with the situation involving their son's brainwashing and recruitment by voodoo slave masters. The immediate challenge is the uncertainty and fear surrounding their son's safety and well-being.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The conflict in the scene is minimal, focusing more on character interactions and humor rather than intense conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create tension and conflict, challenging the protagonist's goals and beliefs. The uncertainty surrounding their son's situation adds depth to the narrative.

High Stakes: 3

The stakes in the scene are low, focusing more on humor and character dynamics rather than intense conflicts or high stakes.

Story Forward: 6

The scene doesn't move the main plot forward significantly but adds layers to the characters and sets up potential future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected behaviors and reactions of the characters, keeping the audience on their toes and intrigued by the unfolding events.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams family's unconventional values and lifestyle clashing with societal norms and expectations. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs and worldview, as they navigate the tension between their unique identity and societal pressures.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including humor, concern for Gomez, and a sense of the Addams family's unique bond.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and reflective of each character's personality, adding to the overall charm of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its quirky characters, dark humor, and intriguing dynamics. The audience is drawn into the Addams family's world and invested in their struggles and interactions.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of dialogue, action, and character interactions that maintain the audience's interest and drive the narrative forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character actions. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the darkly comedic tone of the Addams Family, showcasing Gomez's despair through his obsession with television and junk food. However, the humor could be enhanced by incorporating more absurdity or exaggerated reactions from the family members, particularly in their attempts to comfort Gomez.
  • The dialogue is functional but lacks the sharp wit that characterizes the Addams Family. For instance, Pugsley's line about not understanding Gomez's behavior could be expanded to include a more humorous or insightful observation about their family's quirks.
  • The visual elements, such as the mountain of junk food wrappers, effectively convey Gomez's state of mind, but the scene could benefit from more dynamic staging. For example, having the family members interact more physically with the environment (e.g., fighting over the remote or playfully arguing about what to watch) could add energy to the scene.
  • The pacing feels a bit slow, particularly in the transition from Gomez's phone call to the family's attempts to comfort him. Consider tightening the dialogue and actions to maintain momentum and keep the audience engaged.
  • Granny's entrance is amusing, but her line about dinner being late feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the scene. It could be more integrated into the family's dynamic, perhaps by having her comment on Gomez's state or offering a bizarre dish that reflects the family's dark humor.
Suggestions
  • Add more physical comedy to the scene, such as exaggerated reactions from the children as they bring items to Gomez, or playful banter that highlights their unique personalities.
  • Enhance the dialogue with more clever wordplay or dark humor that reflects the Addams Family's distinctive style. For example, have Morticia suggest a drive in a way that humorously contrasts with Gomez's obsession with TV.
  • Consider incorporating a visual gag, such as a humorous montage of the family trying to find something entertaining on TV, showcasing their bizarre tastes and preferences.
  • Tighten the pacing by reducing the length of some lines or actions, ensuring that the scene flows smoothly and maintains the audience's interest.
  • Integrate Granny's character more into the scene by having her comment on the family's behavior or suggest a bizarre dinner that reflects the Addams family's eccentricity.



Scene 55 -  Midnight Reflections
A155A INT. WAMPUM COURT - LATER A155A*

Morticia is putting Wednesday to bed.

WEDNESDAY
If that man isn't Uncle Fester,
then who is he, mother?

MORTICIA
I don't know, darling. I wish
I did.

WEDNESDAY
Why is that lady doing all this?

MORTICIA
It's hard to say. Sometimes people
have had terrible childhoods. And
sometimes they just haven't found
their special place in life. And
sometimes they're dogs from hell
and must be destroyed.

Morticia kisses Wednesday and she closes her eyes to go
to sleep.

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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 101.

B155 INT. WAMPUM - MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT B155

The family sleeps - all but Morticia. She sits up in
bed beside Gomez. She looks around at her family.

Wednesday sleeps in the same bed as Granny. Lurch is flat
out on the floor. Pugsley uses him for a mattress, and
Thing uses Pugsley. Pugsley snores the inhale part of a
snore, Lurch groans the exhale part, and Thing punctuates
by wiggling.

Morticia stares down at Gomez - for a long beat. She
strokes his hair lovingly. Full of resolve, she gets
out of bed.

CUT TO:

AC155 INT. FESTER'S BEDROOM - NIGHT AC155*

Fester is lying in bed, the covers around his chin.
Abigail sits on the bed beside him, tucking him in.

ABIGAIL
I know why you've been so glum.
It's because it's taking us a
little longer than we'd hoped to
find the gold. Isn't that right?

Fester turns away, depressed.

ABIGAIL
Of course it is. Well, don't you
worry - we're right on the verge.
Tomorrow, for certain, my darling.
(she kisses him on the
forehead, and stands.
She goes to the door,
and turns)
You know, some people might think
it's strange, for a mother and son
to be so close. I think it's
beautiful. Don't you, Gordon?

Fester mumbles something, under his breath.

ABIGAIL
(very stern)
What?

FESTER
(dutifully)
Yes, mother. It's beautiful.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 102.

AC155 CONTINUED: AC155

ABIGAIL
(instantly very sweet,
dabbing her eye with
a fingertip)
Look - I'm weeping.

Abigail exits. The minute the door shuts, Fester gets
out of bed. He is fully clothed. He goes to the window,
and begins to climb out.

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Genres: ["Dark Comedy","Family","Fantasy"]

Summary In this scene, Morticia tucks Wednesday into bed while pondering the mysterious identity of a man who may be Uncle Fester, expressing her concerns about the complexities of family. As the family sleeps in various quirky positions, Fester, feeling glum despite Abigail's attempts to comfort him, sneaks out of his bedroom, seeking freedom from his troubles. The scene captures a blend of tenderness and tension, highlighting the contrasting dynamics of family warmth and individual struggles.
Strengths
  • Nuanced character interactions
  • Darkly humorous tone
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Low external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively balances humor, emotion, and character development, providing insight into the complex relationships within the Addams family. The darkly humorous tone adds depth to the narrative.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring hidden secrets, family loyalty, and dark humor within the Addams family is engaging and well-executed.

Plot: 7

The plot progression in the scene focuses more on character development and emotional depth rather than advancing the overall story. However, it adds depth to the characters and sets the stage for future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and unconventional characters, presents unique family dynamics, and offers a blend of humor and darkness that sets it apart from traditional family narratives.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with complex relationships and motivations. Morticia's resolve, Fester's conflicted feelings, and the dark humor of the Addams family members shine through in this scene.

Character Changes: 7

Morticia's resolve and Fester's conflicted feelings show subtle character changes, hinting at future developments within the family dynamics.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal is to protect her family and maintain their unique identity in the face of external challenges. This reflects her deeper need for security, love, and acceptance.

External Goal: 7

Morticia's external goal is to uncover the truth about the mysterious man in their midst and protect her family from potential harm. This reflects the immediate circumstances of uncertainty and danger they are facing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is emotional conflict and tension within the characters, the scene focuses more on introspection and reflection rather than external conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the mysterious man posing a threat to the family's safety and Morticia's resolve to protect them.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on internal conflicts and character dynamics rather than external threats.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene does not significantly advance the main plot, it sets the stage for future conflicts and reveals hidden secrets that will impact the story.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the mysterious nature of the man in their midst and the potential dangers he poses to the family, creating suspense and tension.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the idea of family loyalty and the lengths one would go to protect their loved ones. Morticia's belief in unconditional love clashes with the deceit and manipulation of the mysterious man.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from humor to sadness, adding depth to the characters and their relationships.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, witty, and reflective of each character's personality. It adds depth to the scene and enhances the darkly humorous tone.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of humor, suspense, and emotional depth, keeping the audience invested in the characters and their relationships.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, while also allowing for moments of emotional connection and character development.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a dark comedy genre, with a balance of dialogue, action, and character development.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Morticia and Wednesday effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family. However, the transition from Morticia's philosophical musings to the more absurd notion of 'dogs from hell' feels abrupt. This could be smoothed out to maintain a consistent tone throughout the exchange.
  • Morticia's character is well-established as nurturing yet darkly humorous, but the scene could benefit from a bit more emotional depth. While she expresses uncertainty about Fester's identity, it might be more impactful if she shared a personal anecdote or a deeper concern about the implications of Fester's return, enhancing the emotional stakes.
  • The visual description of the family sleeping is vivid and humorous, showcasing the chaotic yet loving nature of the Addams household. However, the scene could be enhanced by including more sensory details, such as sounds or smells, to create a more immersive atmosphere.
  • The cut to Fester's bedroom introduces a stark contrast in tone, which is effective. However, the dialogue between Abigail and Fester lacks tension. Fester's depression is clear, but Abigail's overly sweet demeanor could be more sinister to heighten the stakes and create a stronger sense of foreboding.
  • The scene ends with Fester sneaking out of bed, which is a strong visual cue of his internal conflict. However, it might be beneficial to include a brief moment of hesitation or contemplation from Fester before he climbs out the window, adding depth to his character and the gravity of his decision.
Suggestions
  • Consider revising Morticia's dialogue to create a smoother transition between her philosophical thoughts and the punchline about 'dogs from hell.' This could involve adding a line that connects the two ideas more cohesively.
  • Add a personal anecdote or deeper emotional reflection from Morticia regarding Fester's return to enhance the emotional stakes and provide more insight into her character.
  • Incorporate more sensory details in the description of the family sleeping to create a richer atmosphere, such as the sounds of snoring or the smell of the room.
  • Revise Abigail's dialogue to include more sinister undertones, which would create a stronger contrast with Fester's depression and heighten the tension in their relationship.
  • Include a moment of hesitation or internal conflict for Fester before he climbs out the window, which would add depth to his character and emphasize the significance of his decision.



Scene 56 -  Morticia's Dark Flirtation
C155 EXT. BUNGALOW - LATER C155

Morticia, fully dressed, wearing her cloak, heads off
down the walk. Unseen by her, Thing trails after.

CUT TO:

D155 EXT. GATE - A LITTLE LATER D155

Morticia, just outside Gate, struggles to get it open,
Thing clutching the bars, also attempting to block her
way.

MORTICIA
Stop it, you two.

Morticia breaks free of Thing.

CUT TO:

E155 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION - A LITTLE LATER E155

Tully opens the front door. He smiles maliciously at
the sight of Morticia on the stoop.

MORTICIA
I would like to speak with Fester.

Tully steps aside.

TULLY
We've been expecting you...

Morticia crosses the threshold.

CUT TO:

F155 OMITTED F155
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 103.

155 EXT. INTERSECTION AT THE FOOT OF THE ADDAMS HILL - NIGHT 155

Thing does his damnedest to flag down any of the few
oncoming cars. He waves to no avail, DANCES AROUND in
frustration, then tries HITCHHIKING, sticking out his
thumb. A passing car splashes him with mud.

Screwing up his courage, in a kamikaze leap, he GRABS
ahold of the bumper of the next car that comes along and
hangs on for dear life as the car SPEEDS down the street.

CUT TO:

156 INT. STUDY - A LITTLE LATER 156

Morticia is now stretched out on the torture RACK. Fester
and Tully are securing her hands and feet, under Abigail's
supervision. Fester seems torn, agitated, upset.

MORTICIA
(to Abigail, graciously)
You are a desperate woman, consumed
by greed and infinite bitterness.
(a beat)
We could have been such friends.

ABIGAIL
I don't think so. The vault,
Mrs. Addams - any thoughts?

MORTICIA
(sweetly, to Abigail)
Despite everything, I don't hate
you. I pity you. Persecution,
fiendish torture, inhuman depravity -
sometimes it's just not enough.

ABIGAIL
Gordon - let's get started.

FESTER
But, Mother...

ABIGAIL
Stop stalling!

FESTER
I'm not stalling! Stop badgering me!

ABIGAIL
(pushing Fester aside)
Tully, take over! Tighten it!

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 103A.

156 CONTINUED: (2) 156

TULLY
I'd love to, you know that, but -
I've got this stomach thing. When I
torture people. It's just me.

ABIGAIL
(shoving Tully toward
the rack)
Do it!

TULLY
(to Morticia,
politely)
Where's your bathroom?

ABIGAIL
NOW!

Tully shuts his eyes and tightens the rack. Morticia's
bones make a horrible POPPING, STRETCHING SOUND. She
MOANS, rather sensually.

ABIGAIL
Again!

Tully tightens the rack again. More BONE-POPPING NOISES.
Morticia MOANS again, even more orgasmically.

ABIGAIL
Tighter!

Tully tightens the rack a third time. BONE-POPPING NOISES.
Morticia MOANS, very voluptuously. She opens her eyes.
She sighs, in afterglow. She glances at Tully.

MORTICIA
(to Tully, flirtatiously)
You've done this before.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 104.
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a tense yet darkly comedic scene at the Addams mansion, Morticia attempts to confront Fester but is captured and restrained on a torture rack by Tully and Fester under Abigail's supervision. Despite her precarious situation, Morticia maintains her composure and engages in flirtatious banter with Tully, who is reluctant and uncomfortable with the torture. Meanwhile, Thing desperately tries to seek help but faces misfortune. The scene blends tension and absurdity, leaving Morticia's fate unresolved as she continues to flirt with Tully.
Strengths
  • Sharp dialogue
  • Dark humor
  • Character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Potential for the scene to be too dark or unsettling for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written with clever dialogue and a unique concept that adds humor and depth to the story. The darkly humorous tone is consistent and engaging.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using a torture rack as a comedic device in a darkly humorous scene is innovative and adds depth to the characters and their relationships. The scene explores themes of greed, betrayal, and family dynamics in a satirical manner.

Plot: 7

The plot of the scene revolves around Morticia being subjected to a humorous torture session orchestrated by Abigail and Fester. It adds tension and humor to the story while advancing the conflict between the characters.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the theme of family loyalty and the clash of values, with authentic character interactions and unexpected twists.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Morticia, Abigail, and Fester, are well-developed and their personalities shine through in their interactions. The witty dialogue and unique traits of each character enhance the scene.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the interactions and conflicts between the characters reveal more about their personalities and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

Morticia's internal goal is to maintain her composure and dignity in the face of adversity. This reflects her deeper need for control and self-assurance.

External Goal: 7

Morticia's external goal is to confront Fester and Abigail about their actions and intentions. This reflects the immediate challenge of protecting her family and asserting her authority.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

There is a high level of conflict in the scene, both physical (the torture rack) and emotional (the tension between the characters). The conflicting motivations and desires of the characters drive the scene forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Morticia facing physical and emotional challenges that test her resolve and resilience.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high in the scene as Morticia is subjected to a comically exaggerated torture session, highlighting the greed and betrayal within the family dynamic.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by escalating the conflict between the characters and setting up future developments. It adds depth to the relationships and dynamics within the Addams family.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in Morticia's interactions with Abigail and Tully, adding tension and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Morticia's values of grace and empathy, and Abigail's values of greed and cruelty. This challenges Morticia's beliefs in the power of compassion and forgiveness.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene elicits a mix of emotions, including amusement, tension, and intrigue. The dark humor and sarcastic tone create an emotional impact that resonates with the audience.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue in the scene is sharp, witty, and filled with dark humor. It effectively conveys the relationships between the characters and adds depth to their interactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of suspense, humor, and character dynamics, keeping the audience invested in Morticia's plight.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, with well-timed reveals and character interactions.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to the expected format for a dark comedy genre, with concise descriptions and clear scene headings.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined beats and transitions, maintaining the tension and pacing effectively.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the dark humor characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through Morticia's witty dialogue and the absurdity of her situation. However, the pacing feels uneven, especially during the torture sequence. The tension could be heightened by allowing more time for Morticia's interactions with Tully and Abigail before the physical torture begins, creating a stronger emotional impact.
  • Morticia's flirtatious banter amidst the torture is a clever juxtaposition, but it risks undermining the stakes of the scene. While it aligns with her character, the balance between humor and danger could be better calibrated to maintain suspense. The audience should feel the threat to Morticia while still enjoying her wit.
  • Fester's internal conflict is introduced but not fully explored. His agitation and torn feelings could be emphasized more through his actions or expressions, allowing the audience to connect with his struggle. This would add depth to his character and enhance the emotional stakes of the scene.
  • The dialogue between Abigail and Morticia is sharp and engaging, but Tully's character lacks a clear motivation beyond being a passive participant. His reluctance to torture Morticia feels inconsistent with the overall tone of the scene. Providing him with a more defined personality or backstory could make his character more compelling.
  • The physical comedy of Thing attempting to flag down cars is a nice touch, but it feels disconnected from the main action of the scene. Integrating this subplot more seamlessly with Morticia's predicament could enhance the overall cohesion of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider extending the buildup before the torture begins, allowing for more dialogue and interaction between Morticia, Tully, and Abigail to heighten the tension.
  • Reassess the balance between humor and danger in Morticia's dialogue during the torture. Ensure that her wit does not detract from the seriousness of her situation.
  • Develop Fester's character further by showing more of his internal conflict through visual cues or additional dialogue that reflects his struggle with his mother's demands versus his feelings for Morticia.
  • Give Tully a clearer motivation or personality trait that drives his actions, making him a more active participant in the scene rather than a passive character.
  • Integrate Thing's subplot more effectively with Morticia's situation, perhaps by having him play a role in her rescue or by providing comic relief that ties back to the main action.



Scene 57 -  A Desperate Plea for Help
157 EXT. WAMPUM COURT - NIGHT 157

A hand possessed, Thing RACES up the driveway, raising
dust as he goes.

158 EXT. BUNGALOW - NIGHT 158

Thing leaps dramatically onto the porch, then stops dead
to knock on the cabin door.

After a beat:

GOMEZ (O.S.)
Who is it? We're paid through
Thursday.

He opens the door. Thing rushes in.

CUT TO:

159 INT. BUNGALOW - MINUTES LATER 159

Thing skitters on the kitchen counter, frantically
signing. In the background, the rest of the family
sleeps.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/26/91 105.

159 CONTINUED: 159

GOMEZ
(whispers)
Slow down, Thing! It's terrible
when you stutter!

Frustrated, Thing grabs a SPOON and begins tapping out
MORSE CODE.

GOMEZ
Morticia in danger... stop! Send
help at once ... stop!

Thing flops down in exhausted triumph. Gomez grabs him
and heads off.

CUT TO:

160 OMITTED 160

161 INT. GOMEZ'S STUDY - A FEW MINUTES LATER 161

Morticia is now lashed to an ENORMOUS TORTURE WHEEL.
Tully and Abigail are tending the stick BRANDING IRONS
stuck in the roaring fire.

FESTER
(to Abigail)
You can't! Not with red-hot pokers!

TULLY
(queasy)
Is this gonna smell?

MORTICIA
(graciously, with
understanding)
Tully Alford - charlatan. Deadbeat.
Parasite. How Gomez adored you.

TULLY
Well, not enough.

FESTER
Morticia, please...

MORTICIA
Dear Fester - or whomever you are.
Which is the real you - the loathsome,
under-handed monster you've become?
Or the loathsome, underhanded monster
we came to love?

FESTER
(desperately)
Don't ask me...
(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 4/03/91 105A.

161 CONTINUED: 161

MORTICIA
Fester - I saw you tonight, at my
window. I know it was you.

ABIGAIL
(furious)
Gordon?

FESTER
(very upset)
I was... restless! I couldn't sleep.

ABIGAIL
Gordon, I have a thought. Just a
notion, top of my head. Tell me what
you think. Since you and Mrs. Addams
are so very close...

Abigail takes a red-hot POKER out of the fire and hands it
to Fester.

ABIGAIL
... be my guest.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/17/90 106.

162 OMITTED 162
thru thru
164 164
Genres: ["Comedy","Dark Comedy","Family"]

Summary In a frantic scene, Thing races to the Addams family cabin to alert Gomez that Morticia is in danger. Using Morse code, Thing conveys the urgency of the situation as Gomez listens intently. Meanwhile, Morticia finds herself tied to a torture wheel, engaging in a tense conversation with Fester, who is torn between his past feelings for her and the pressure from Abigail to harm her. The scene is filled with dark humor and urgency, culminating in a moment of impending confrontation as Abigail hands Fester a red-hot poker.
Strengths
  • Dark humor
  • Tension
  • Character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Potential for the scene to become too melodramatic or over-the-top

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines dark humor, character dynamics, and tension to create an engaging and memorable moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of Morticia being restrained on a torture wheel while confronting Fester's identity crisis and Abigail's manipulation is intriguing and adds depth to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with key revelations about Fester's true identity and the family dynamics coming to light.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to familiar themes, with authentic character actions and dialogue that reflect the Addams Family's unconventional nature.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and their interactions reveal layers of complexity and emotion, especially Morticia's composed yet provocative demeanor.

Character Changes: 7

Morticia undergoes a subtle change in her demeanor, from composed to flirtatious, as she navigates the challenging situation on the torture wheel.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to save Morticia from danger and prove his loyalty to the family. This reflects his deeper desire for acceptance and belonging within the Addams Family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to rescue Morticia from the torture wheel and confront the villains. This reflects the immediate challenge of protecting his family from harm.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense, with Morticia being physically restrained and emotionally challenged by Fester and Abigail, creating a tense and dramatic atmosphere.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing difficult choices and moral dilemmas that challenge their beliefs and values.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, with Morticia's physical and emotional well-being at risk, as well as the family's relationships and loyalties being tested.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by revealing key information about Fester's identity and the family dynamics, setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the plot, as well as the characters' conflicting motivations and actions.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around loyalty, identity, and betrayal. Morticia questions Fester's true nature and intentions, challenging his beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from dark humor to tension to empathy for Morticia's predicament, making it emotionally impactful.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is sharp and witty, adding to the darkly humorous tone of the scene and enhancing the character dynamics.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its suspenseful atmosphere, witty dialogue, and dramatic conflict that keeps the audience invested in the characters' fates.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a sense of urgency and tension, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with concise descriptions and clear scene transitions that enhance readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear progression of events and character interactions that build tension and suspense.


Critique
  • The scene effectively maintains the darkly comedic tone characteristic of the Addams Family, particularly through Morticia's witty dialogue and the absurdity of the situation. However, the pacing feels uneven, especially in the transition from Thing's frantic arrival to the tension in the study. The urgency of Thing's message could be heightened to create a more immediate sense of danger for Morticia.
  • Morticia's dialogue is clever and showcases her character's strength and wit, but it could benefit from more emotional depth. While she maintains her composure, exploring her internal conflict or fear could add layers to her character and heighten the stakes of the scene.
  • Fester's character is portrayed as conflicted, but his motivations are somewhat unclear. Clarifying his internal struggle between loyalty to Morticia and submission to Abigail would enhance the emotional stakes and make his eventual actions more impactful.
  • The introduction of Tully and Abigail as antagonists is effective, but their motivations could be fleshed out further. Tully's queasiness adds humor, but it also detracts from the tension. Balancing their comedic elements with a more menacing presence could create a stronger sense of danger.
  • The use of Morse code as a communication method is a clever touch, but it may come off as a bit too whimsical given the dire situation. Finding a balance between humor and tension is crucial, and perhaps a more straightforward method of communication could be employed to maintain the urgency.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment where Thing's urgency is visually represented, such as a close-up of Morticia's face showing her concern as she hears the commotion, to create a stronger emotional connection.
  • Deepen Morticia's internal conflict by including a brief flashback or memory that highlights her relationship with Fester, which could serve to heighten the emotional stakes of her current predicament.
  • Clarify Fester's motivations by including a line or two that reflects his internal struggle, perhaps expressing his fear of losing Morticia or his desire to break free from Abigail's control.
  • Enhance Tully and Abigail's menace by incorporating more serious dialogue or actions that reflect their intentions, making them feel like a more credible threat rather than just comedic foils.
  • Reconsider the use of Morse code for communication; perhaps have Thing use a more direct method, like pointing or gesturing, to convey urgency while still maintaining the humor of his character.



Scene 58 -  Storm of Chaos
A165 INT. DUESENBERG - NIGHT A165

Gomez cuts the engine. The car glides silently through
Gate -- who opens uncharacteristically without a creak.
Gomez stops the car and skulks out. Thing skulks after
him.

Gomez sees the reflections of the roaring fire through
the study window.

CUT TO:

165 INT. STUDY - SAME TIME 165

As Fester takes the poker and approaches Morticia -

GOMEZ CRASHES THROUGH THE WINDOW, in a back-flip.

Thing JUDO-FLIPS in after Gomez.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 107.

165 CONTINUED: 165

GOMEZ
Cara mia!

MORTICIA
Mon cher!

ABIGAIL
Addams!

Thing tosses Gomez a saber off the study wall.

Tully also grabs a saber, and approaches Gomez from behind.

MORTICIA
Darling, take care!

Without even looking, Gomez parries Tully's blow from
behind. Then he whirls on Tully.

GOMEZ
Dirty pool, old man. Never again!

TULLY
This is for keeps, Gomez! Not
just doubloons!

Tully feints, then slashes - shredding the front of Gomez's
jacket.

GOMEZ
One for you, Tully, and...

Gomez ATTACKS - HIS BLADE FLASHING LIKE LIGHTNING. In a
blur of action, Tully's sword is knocked from his hand and
he's sent tumbling backwards, finally landing on his knees.

GOMEZ
... one for me!

Tully looks up at Gomez with cowardly, pleading eyes.

TULLY
Gomez... it's Tully. I'm your
lawyer. I'm on retainer.

ABIGAIL (O.S.)
Let him up!

Gomez turns to see...

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 108.

165 CONTINUED: (2) 165

ABIGAIL -

who now has a pistol aimed at Morticia. One shot and
Morticia will die horribly.

Gomez throws aside his sword. Tully scrambles to his
feet.

ABIGAIL
(to Gomez)
That's right! Now get moving -
Addams, take him to the vault.
And if you're not back in one
hour...
(the pistol aimed
at Morticia, and
using her accent)
I displace her.

Gomez is near enough now to take Morticia's hand, on the
torture wheel.

GOMEZ
Tish - seeing you like this. My
blood boils.

MORTICIA
As does mine.

GOMEZ
(touching the
torture wheel)
This wheel of pain...

MORTICIA
Our wheel.

CU on Fester, confused at watching this emotional
display.

GOMEZ
(to Morticia)
To live without you - only that
would be torture.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 109.

165 CONTINUED: (3) 165

MORTICIA
(to Gomez)
A day alone - only that would be
death.

Gomez kisses Morticia's hand.

ABIGAIL
Knock it off! The vault, Addams -
right now!

FESTER
But, Mother can't we...

Gomez reaches for the book that will open the secret
panel:

ABIGAIL
Can it, Gordon! Stop dragging your
feet! You disgust me - you're nothing
but a useless, snivelling baby! A
stone around my neck! What was I
thinking - I should've left you where
I found you!

At Abigail's final words, Fester suddenly LEAPS FORWARD.

FESTER
No tricks, Gomez! That's the wrong
book!

CLOSE UP

Gomez's hand is on the right book, "Greed," but Fester
stops him from pulling it.

FESTER
Allow me...

Gomez looks into Fester's eyes -- realizing what he's
about to do.

GOMEZ
(murmuring)
Good show, old man...

Fester reaches for a DIFFERENT BOOK -- "Hurricane Irene:
Nightmare from Above."

Seeing the title of the book, Tully suddenly panics:

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 110.

165 CONTINUED: (4) 165

TULLY
Put that book down, Gordon! You
don't know what it can do! It's
not just literture!

FESTER
(advancing on Tully)
Oh, really?

TULLY
I'm your friend, Gordon - think
of the doubloons!

FESTER
They're not yours, Tully! Back off!

ANGLE on Gomez, releasing Morticia from the torture wheel.

MORTICIA
Quickly, my darling!

He helps her down from the wheel.

GOMEZ
Leather straps, red-hot pokers...

MORTICIA
Later, my dearest.

ANGLE on Fester, facing off with Abigail, as Tully cowers.

ABIGAIL
Keep the book closed, Gordon -
listen to mother!

FESTER
I'll never listen to you - not
ever again!

ABIGAIL
I had to be strict with you -
because I cared! Put it down!

FESTER
You never really loved me!

ANGLE on Gomez and Morticia, nearing the bookcase.

GOMEZ
Come, my love - to safety!

MORTICIA
But what of Fester?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/28/91 110A.

165 CONTINUED: (5) 165

GOMEZ
(calling out, to Fester)
Old man, this way!

ANGLE on Abigail and Fester.

ABIGAIL
Stop whining, you little good-
for-nothing! Be a man!

FESTER
You're a terrible mother! There,
I said it!

Fester opens the book, and blasts Tully out of the window.
Then he blasts Abigail out as well.

ANGLE ON GOMEZ, who has now pulled the right book, "Greed",
to open the bookshelf. Amid the storm, he is leading
Morticia behind the bookshelf. He tries to hold the
bookshelf open for Fester to follow, fighting the gale
force winds.

GOMEZ
(calling out to Fester)
Old man! This way!

ANGLE ON THING, across the room, struggling across the
floor toward the bookshelf. Thing fights the wind,
which pelts him with papers and other flying debris.

Gomez can no longer fight the storm, and the bookshelf
slams shut. Fester desperately tries to close the book to
quell the storm, but a HUGE BOLT OF LIGHTNING ZAPS HIM.
He falls to the floor, with electricity coursing through
him.

MOVE IN on the storm raging within the pages of the book,
then -

FADE TO BLACK
FADE IN ON:

166 OMITTED 166
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169 169

170 OMITTED 170

171 OMITTED 171
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173 173
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/28/91 110B.
Genres: ["Comedy","Action","Drama"]

Summary In a dramatic showdown at the Addams family study, Gomez makes a heroic entrance through the window to confront Tully, who is threatening Morticia. As a sword fight ensues, Abigail holds Morticia at gunpoint, forcing Gomez to comply. Fester, emboldened, confronts Abigail and opens a mysterious book that unleashes a storm, sending Tully and Abigail flying out the window. Amidst the chaos, Gomez tries to rescue Morticia while Fester struggles with the book, culminating in a bolt of lightning striking him as the scene fades to black.
Strengths
  • Intense conflict
  • Emotional depth
  • Strong character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Some cliched dialogue
  • Predictable character actions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotional, and action-packed, with high stakes and significant character development.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the scene, including the use of a storm conjured from a book and a dramatic confrontation, is innovative and engaging.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is crucial to the overall story, as it involves a major conflict and reveals important character dynamics.

Originality: 8

The scene offers a fresh take on the classic themes of loyalty, betrayal, and family dynamics within a gothic setting. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic to the Addams Family universe, adding to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their interactions drive the scene forward, showcasing their relationships and motivations.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters undergo significant changes during the scene, particularly Fester and Abigail.

Internal Goal: 9

Gomez's internal goal is to protect his family, especially Morticia, and maintain his honor and integrity in the face of danger. This reflects his deep love for his wife and his desire to uphold the Addams family values.

External Goal: 8

Gomez's external goal is to outsmart and defeat the antagonists, Abigail and Tully, in order to save Morticia and protect his family's legacy. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of the situation and the threat to his loved ones.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and drives the action forward, creating tension and drama.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing off against each other in a battle of wits and physical prowess. The audience is left unsure of the outcome, adding to the tension and excitement.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high in the scene, with characters' lives and relationships on the line.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, revealing key plot points and character motivations.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists, betrayals, and character revelations. The audience is kept on their toes as the story takes unexpected turns.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the themes of loyalty, family bonds, and betrayal. Gomez must navigate his loyalty to his family against the betrayal of his lawyer, Tully, and the manipulative actions of Abigail.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, with moments of love, betrayal, and tension that resonate with the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is sharp, emotional, and impactful, adding depth to the character interactions and conflict.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its mix of action, drama, and humor. The high stakes, emotional conflicts, and dynamic character interactions keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and suspenseful moments. The rhythm of the scene keeps the audience engaged and builds tension effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, action descriptions, and character dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined action beats, character interactions, and escalating tension. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in building suspense and drama.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the chaotic and darkly comedic tone characteristic of the Addams Family. The action sequences, particularly Gomez's dramatic entrance and the ensuing sword fight, are visually engaging and maintain a sense of urgency.
  • The dialogue is sharp and witty, particularly the exchanges between Gomez, Morticia, and Tully. However, some lines could benefit from further refinement to enhance clarity and impact. For instance, Tully's line about 'this is for keeps' feels a bit vague and could be more specific to heighten the stakes.
  • Fester's internal conflict is introduced but not fully explored in this scene. While his confusion is evident, the emotional stakes could be heightened by providing more insight into his feelings about Morticia and Abigail's manipulation. This would deepen the audience's investment in his character.
  • The pacing of the scene is generally good, but the transition from the sword fight to the emotional confrontation with Abigail feels slightly abrupt. A smoother transition could enhance the flow and maintain the tension throughout.
  • The visual elements, such as the storm and the chaos in the study, are compelling. However, the description of the storm raging within the pages of the book could be more vivid to create a stronger sense of danger and urgency.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief moment of hesitation or internal struggle for Fester before he confronts Abigail. This could provide a more nuanced portrayal of his character and heighten the emotional stakes.
  • Refine Tully's dialogue to make his motivations clearer. Instead of vague threats, consider giving him a more specific reason for his actions that ties back to his relationship with Gomez.
  • Enhance the transition between the action and emotional confrontation by including a moment where Gomez acknowledges the danger Morticia is in, which would heighten the stakes and urgency.
  • Add more descriptive language to the storm scene to create a more vivid and immersive experience for the audience. Consider using metaphors or similes to convey the chaos and danger more effectively.
  • Ensure that the emotional stakes for Morticia are clear throughout the scene. Perhaps include a line where she expresses her fear or concern for Fester, which would add depth to her character and the overall conflict.



Scene 59 -  A Spooktacular Welcome
174 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION, NEXT OCTOBER - NIGHT 174

A group of little CHILDREN approach the front door. There
is a hand-lettered sign on the door reading "HALLOWEEN
OPEN HOUSE." The children are dressed in traditional
Halloween costumes - there's a witch, a ghost, a skeleton,
etc., and they all carry trick-or-treat bags. They giggle
and chatter. One of the children is pushed forward, and
he KNOCKS on the front door. As the door opens, the
children CHANT:

CHILDREN
Trick or...

They freeze in mid-chant. We do not see who has opened
the door, but the children do. After a beat, they SCREAM
IN HORROR and run, terrified, back toward the street.

CUT TO:
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 12/3/90 111.

175 INT. FRONT HALL - SAME TIME 175

Lurch is closing the front door, looking puzzled.

The family is busily decorating the house for their annual
Halloween festivities. All the decorations are elegant
yet ancient, dusty and faded. The crystal gloves in the
chandeliers have been replaced by miniature jack o-
lanterns. Skeletons, each wearing a top hat, hang from
the sconces by the nooses around their necks. There are
clusters of black and orange balloons, covered with
cobwebs. Uncle Fester and Thing are draping the banisters
and stairway railings with a garland made from crepe
paper, dead branches and spanish moss. Skulls, each
holding a candle, are scattered about, on the stairs and
the furniture. A stuffed, life-size scarecrow leans
against the stairway, with a pitchfork through its throat.
A banner on the wall reads "HAPPY HALLOWEEN", and the
letters drip with blood.

Gomez hangs upside down from the balcony. Morticia hands
him a decoration.

Granny appears from the kitchen, carrying a tray of food.

GRANNY
Well, it's their loss. I even
made finger sandwiches.

Perched on Fester's shoulder, Thing shakes in fear.

FESTER
(petting Thing)
Oh, calm down.

PUGSLEY (O.S.)
Here we come!

Wednesday and Pugsley come down the stairs. Wednesday
is dressed in her usual style, but Pugsley is dressed as
a tiny version of UNCLE FESTER, COMPLETE WITH BALD HEAD AND
GREATCOAT. The adults are delighted. Gomez flips down
onto his feet.

GOMEZ
Pugsley, old man!

MORTICIA
(delighted)
Look at you.

PUGSLEY
(to Uncle Fester)
How do you like it?

Fester is very touched; he picks Pugsley up.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/15/91 111A.

175 CONTINUED: 175

FESTER
What can I say? He's going to
break hearts.

GOMEZ
Let's get a picture! Lurch?

MORTICIA
Oh yes - in the den.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 11/20/90 112.

175 CONTINUED: 175

Everyone starts to move toward the den. There is a KNOCK
on the door. Everyone turns. Lurch opens the door.

Standing outside are Margaret and Cousin It. Margaret is
dressed as a fairy princess, complete with wand. Cousin
It wears a cowboy hat, a bandanna and a holster. Margaret
is radiant, obviously very much in love.

MARGARET
Trick or treat!

COUSIN IT
Ooot oot glibber.

GOMEZ
Look, everyone! We have guests!

MORTICIA
Hello, Margaret. Cousin It - I
almost didn't recognize you.

MARGARET
Isn't he handsome? Everyone keeps
asking where he bought his costume.

GOMEZ
(admiringly)
It is a wonderful hat.

MARGARET
(to Wednesday)
And what are you, darling? Where's
your costume?

WEDNESDAY
(solemnly)
This is my costume. I'm a homicidal
maniac. They look just like everyone
else.

CUT TO:
Genres: ["Comedy","Horror"]

Summary On Halloween night, a group of costumed children approaches the Addams Mansion for an open house but screams in terror and flees when they see the Addams family. Inside, the family joyfully prepares for the festivities, with Pugsley dressed as Uncle Fester and Wednesday humorously claiming her costume is a 'homicidal maniac.' As they decorate with spooky elegance, Margaret and Cousin It arrive, adding to the festive atmosphere, while Granny brings food, showcasing the family's whimsical and darkly humorous charm.
Strengths
  • Unique and macabre decorations
  • Humorous interactions between family members
  • Setting the tone for a Halloween celebration
Weaknesses
  • Lack of significant conflict or high stakes

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the essence of the Addams family with its dark humor and eerie atmosphere. It sets the stage for a fun and entertaining Halloween celebration.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Addams family hosting a Halloween open house is intriguing and aligns well with their dark and quirky personalities.

Plot: 7

While the plot of the scene mainly focuses on the family preparing for the Halloween event, it serves as a fun and engaging setup for potential conflicts and interactions.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases originality through its fresh take on Halloween celebrations, unconventional character interactions, and darkly comedic dialogue that sets it apart from traditional holiday scenes.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their eccentric and unique personalities, adding depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 5

There are subtle hints of character dynamics and relationships, but no significant character changes occur in this scene.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to enjoy and celebrate Halloween with their family, showcasing their love for the holiday and their unique sense of style.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to welcome and entertain guests who arrive at their mansion for Halloween, showcasing their hospitality and eccentricity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there is not a significant conflict in this scene, the potential for conflicts and unexpected events is hinted at, adding anticipation.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with contrasting values and beliefs between the Addams family and societal norms creating tension and conflict that drive the narrative forward.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on the family's preparations for a festive event rather than intense conflicts or challenges.

Story Forward: 7

The scene sets the stage for potential developments and interactions, moving the story forward in a lighthearted and entertaining manner.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected character interactions, dark humor, and unconventional responses that keep the audience guessing about the Addams family's next move.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the Addams family's unconventional beliefs and values, contrasting with societal norms and expectations of Halloween celebrations.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including amusement, curiosity, and a sense of the family's unique bond.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is witty, darkly humorous, and reflective of the Addams family's distinct communication style.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its unique setting, eccentric characters, dark humor, and intriguing conflicts that draw the audience into the Addams family's world.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing character interactions, dialogue, and descriptions to maintain the audience's interest and build tension.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue that enhance the visual and narrative elements.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre by setting up the Halloween festivities, introducing characters, and establishing conflicts and interactions within the Addams family.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and darkly comedic tone characteristic of the Addams Family. The juxtaposition of innocent children in Halloween costumes with the eerie atmosphere of the Addams Mansion creates a humorous contrast that aligns well with the family's quirky nature.
  • The use of visual details, such as the decorations and the children's costumes, enhances the scene's atmosphere. Descriptions like 'skeletons wearing top hats' and 'letters dripping with blood' vividly illustrate the Addams family's unique take on Halloween, making it both spooky and charming.
  • The dialogue is sharp and reflects the characters' personalities well. Pugsley's costume as a mini Uncle Fester is a delightful touch that adds to the humor and familial bond. Wednesday's line about being a 'homicidal maniac' is particularly effective, showcasing her dark humor and setting the tone for the family's unconventional approach to life.
  • However, the pacing could be improved. The transition from the children's initial excitement to their horror could be more pronounced. A brief moment of suspense or a hint of what they see could enhance the comedic impact of their reaction.
  • The introduction of Margaret and Cousin It is a nice touch, but their entrance feels slightly abrupt. A more gradual build-up to their arrival, perhaps with a brief exchange among the family members about expecting guests, could create a smoother transition and heighten anticipation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a moment of suspense before the door opens, such as a close-up of the children's excited faces or a lingering shot of the ominous door, to build tension before their reaction.
  • Enhance the dialogue between the Addams family members as they prepare for Halloween. A few more playful exchanges could deepen their relationships and showcase their unique dynamics.
  • Introduce a brief moment of confusion or curiosity from the children before they scream. This could involve them peeking through the door or exchanging nervous glances, which would amplify the comedic effect of their sudden fright.
  • Explore the reactions of the Addams family to the children's fear. Their nonchalant or amused responses could further emphasize the absurdity of the situation and highlight their dark humor.
  • Consider adding a visual gag or a humorous mishap during the decorating process that could serve as a comedic interlude before the children arrive, enhancing the overall pacing and flow of the scene.



Scene 60 -  Halloween Revelry at the Addams Mansion
176 INT. DINING ROOM - A FEW MINUTES LATER 176

Fester and Pugsley are posed at one end of the room.
Lurch has set up an easel and canvas; he is painting
Fester and Pugsley's portrait.

Gomez and Wednesday are sitting on the floor amid
newspapers, carving a pumpkin.

Morticia is knitting. Margaret and Cousin It sit together,
holding hands. Granny brings people cups of steaming
punch, from a punch bowl.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 113.

176 CONTINUED: 176

FESTER
Halloween - it's such a special
time. Ghosts and goblins. Witches
on broomsticks.

WEDNESDAY
Children begging in the streets.

FESTER
I'm so glad I can share this night
with my family - my real family.
Now that I've got my memory back.

MORTICIA
That unfortunate woman. Filled with
evil.
(shaking her head,
sadly)
But not enough.

PUGSLEY
(to Fester)
She wasn't your mother. She just
said that.

COUSIN IT
Ooot oot gleep.

GOMEZ
(to It)
You remember, old sport - she really
did find him tangled in a tuna net,
twenty-five years ago. With amnesia.

WEDNESDAY
From the Bermuda Triangle.

COUSIN IT
Ooot oot oot.

MORTICIA
How true. Stranger things have
happened.

MARGARET
I'm sorry, and I'm not bitter,
but I blame Tully.

COUSIN IT
Ooot blipper gleep.

MARGARET
(the coquette)
Oh, stop. I'm blushing.

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 113A.

176 CONTINUED: 176

GRANNY
(to Fester)
Thank God for that lightning.
Knocked some sense into you.

PUGSLEY
Please, Uncle Fester?

GOMEZ
(jovially)
Pugsley...

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 2/19/91 114.

176 CONTINUED: (2) 176

PUGSLEY
For the picture?

Fester pops a light bulb into his mouth. It lights.
Pugsley giggles.

Gomez stands up, having finished the pumpkin. He places
it on a table, and lights the candle inside. The pumpkin
glows. It has ONE EYE IN THE MIDDLE OF ITS FOREHEAD.
Everyone oohs and ahhs.

FESTER
You know, all the old sayings are
true. There's no place like home.
And blood is thicker than water.

MORTICIA
And just as refreshing.

GOMEZ
All right, everybody - time for a
game! What shall it be - bobbing
for apples?

MARGARET
Charades?

COUSIN IT
Ooot glibber glip.

MORTICIA
Of course - "Wake The Dead."

FESTER
(delighted, to Gomez
remembering this childhood
favorite)
"Wake The Dead"!

GOMEZ
(equally excited)
"Wake The Dead"! Out to the cemetery!
Come on, everyone!

Everyone starts to exit, chattering happily.

MARGARET
(to Granny)
I've never played this before -
how does it go?

GRANNY
Did you bring a shovel?

(CONTINUED)
THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 114A.

176 CONTINUED: (3) 176

PUGSLEY
Uncle Fester, will you be on my team?

WEDNESDAY
No, mine!

FESTER
(to Wednesday)
I tell you what - we'll give you a
head start. Three skulls and a
pelvis - how's that?

Pugsley and Wednesday cheer and run out. Fester faces
Gomez.

FESTER
My own dear brother - who could be
more precious?

GOMEZ
Blood is thicker than water, old man.

MORTICIA
(touched by the
brothers devotion)
And just as refreshing.

Gomez offers his hand. Fester takes it, in a manly
handshake.

GOMEZ
Let us never be parted.

FESTER
Let us always be as one.

Fester flips Gomez in a JUDO FLIP.

Gomez LANDS -

At the foot of a glass display case. The camera pans up
the case. It contains ABIGAIL AND TULLY, EXPERTLY
MOUNTED AND STUFFED.

Fester rises, dusting himself off.

FESTER
(joyfully, to Gomez
and Morticia)
Come on!

MORTICIA
We'll catch up.

Fester runs out.
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THE ADDAMS FAMILY - 3/18/91 115-117.

177 OMITTED 177


178 INT. FRONT HALL 178

Everyone is gone. Morticia and Gomez have drifted into
the front hall; they are moving toward the front door.

MORTICIA
(deeply satisfied)
Our family... what are they?

GOMEZ
Oh, Tish - what a night. Everyone
-- together at last. What more
could we ask?

MORTICIA
Gomez?

Morticia holds up the garment she's been knitting - it's
a BABY JUMPER WITH THREE LEGS.

GOMEZ
(ecstatic)
Cara mia... is it true?

MORTICIA
(shaking her head
"yes")
Oui, mon cher...

They embrace, as the front door SWINGS OPEN, of its own
accord.

CUT TO:

179 EXT. ADDAMS MANSION - SAME TIME 179

Morticia and Gomez are silhouetted in the doorway. There
is a FULL MOON. In the distance, a wolf HOWLS. Wispy
GHOSTS flit through the night sky. A human SCREAM is
heard, followed by Granny's CACKLE. In the cemetery,
torches are seen, like fireflies.


FADE OUT.



THE END
Genres: ["Comedy","Horror","Family"]

Summary In the Addams family's dining room, Fester and Pugsley pose for a portrait while Gomez and Wednesday carve a pumpkin, celebrating Halloween with playful banter and nostalgia. Fester expresses gratitude for his family after regaining his memory, leading to excitement over a game called 'Wake The Dead.' The scene highlights the strong familial bonds, culminating in a brotherly moment between Fester and Gomez. Morticia reveals her pregnancy, adding to the festive atmosphere as the scene concludes with a ghostly ambiance outside the mansion.
Strengths
  • Witty dialogue
  • Unique character interactions
  • Blend of comedy and dark themes
Weaknesses
  • Mild conflict resolution
  • Lack of significant character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written with a good balance of humor, dark themes, and family dynamics. It effectively showcases the unique characteristics of the Addams family.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a Halloween celebration with the Addams family is engaging and well-executed, blending comedy with dark themes effectively.

Plot: 7

The plot revolves around the family coming together for Halloween, with elements of humor and supernatural occurrences. It serves as a fun and entertaining interlude in the overall story.

Originality: 9

The scene showcases original situations and fresh approaches to family dynamics, with authentic character actions and dialogue that reflect the Addams Family's eccentricity.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed and stay true to their unique personalities, adding depth and humor to the scene.

Character Changes: 5

There are subtle character interactions, but no significant changes occur in this scene.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to feel a sense of belonging and connection with his family, now that he has regained his memory. This reflects his deeper need for acceptance and love.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to participate in the family game 'Wake The Dead' and enjoy the Halloween festivities. This reflects the immediate circumstances of the scene and the challenges of fitting in with his eccentric family.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

There is a mild conflict between characters, but it is mostly lighthearted and adds to the humor of the scene.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is mild, with playful banter and challenges that add humor and tension without creating significant obstacles for the characters.

High Stakes: 5

The stakes are relatively low in this scene, focusing more on humor and family interactions.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by showcasing the family dynamics and setting the stage for future events.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the eccentric nature of the Addams Family and the unexpected twists in their interactions and dialogue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the theme of family bonds and acceptance. The protagonist's realization of his true family challenges his beliefs about identity and belonging.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 6

The scene evokes a mix of emotions, including amusement, nostalgia, and a sense of family bonding.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is witty, humorous, and in line with the characters' personalities, adding to the overall charm of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its witty dialogue, quirky character interactions, and the anticipation of the family game 'Wake The Dead'.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by smoothly transitioning between character interactions, dialogue exchanges, and the progression towards the family game 'Wake The Dead'.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with proper scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character introductions, dialogue exchanges, and a progression towards the family game 'Wake The Dead'.


Critique
  • The scene effectively captures the whimsical and darkly comedic tone characteristic of the Addams Family, showcasing the family's unique dynamics and their celebration of Halloween. However, the dialogue could benefit from sharper wit and more punchy exchanges to enhance the humor.
  • Fester's character arc culminates in this scene, as he expresses gratitude for his family and reflects on his past. This emotional depth is commendable, but it could be further emphasized by contrasting his joyful demeanor with a brief moment of introspection about his previous life with Abigail.
  • The interactions among the characters are lively and engaging, but some lines, particularly from Margaret and Cousin It, feel somewhat repetitive. Streamlining their dialogue could help maintain the scene's momentum and focus on the central characters.
  • The transition to the game 'Wake The Dead' is a strong plot point that ties back to the family's traditions. However, the explanation of the game could be more vivid or humorous to pique the audience's interest and set the stage for the upcoming chaos.
  • The visual elements, such as the glowing pumpkin and the portrait being painted, are delightful and contribute to the scene's atmosphere. However, the description of the setting could be expanded to include more sensory details, enhancing the reader's immersion in the Addams' Halloween festivities.
Suggestions
  • Consider tightening the dialogue to make it snappier and more impactful, ensuring each character's voice is distinct and memorable.
  • Add a moment where Fester briefly reflects on his past with Abigail, perhaps through a humorous or darkly comedic line, to deepen his character development.
  • Streamline or condense the dialogue from secondary characters like Margaret and Cousin It to keep the focus on the main characters and their interactions.
  • Enhance the description of the game 'Wake The Dead' to create anticipation and excitement, possibly by including a humorous anecdote or a quirky rule that showcases the Addams' unique approach to Halloween.
  • Incorporate more sensory details in the setting description, such as the smell of the punch, the sound of laughter, or the flickering candlelight, to create a more immersive experience for the audience.