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Scene 1 -  Unease on the Farm
EXT. THE STRATOSPHERE - DAY

BURNING through the fringes of space -

INT. COCKPIT - CONTINUOUS

A young PILOT fights his BUFFETING craft -
RADIO
(O.S.)
Computer says you’re too tight -

PILOT
I got this -
The Pilot grabs a panicked glance at his instruments -

RADIO
(O.S.)
Crossing the Straights ... shutting
it down, Cooper. Shutting it all
down ...
2.

PILOT
NO! I need the power up -

EXT. THE STRATOSPHERE - CONTINUOUS

The BLACK and RED SKY starts SPINNING HORRIFYINGLY -

INT. COCKPIT - DAY

As the controls RIP themselves free, the pilot SHOUTS and we
-
CUT TO:


INT. BEDROOM, FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
A man WAKES, nightmare SWEATY. This is COOPER.
YOUNG GIRL’S VOICE
(O.S.)
Dad? Dad?
Cooper turns: in the doorway - his sleepy ten-year-old
daughter. This is MURPH.

COOPER
Sorry. Go back to sleep.
MURPH
I thought you were the ghost.

COOPER
There’s no ghost, Murph.
MURPH
Grandpa says you can get ghosts.

COOPER
Maybe Grandpa’s a little too close
to being one himself. Back to
sleep.
MURPH
Were you dreaming about the crash?
COOPER
Back to sleep, Murph.

Murph shuffles back out the door. Cooper moves to the
window. DAWN breaks over an ENDLESS SEA OF CORN ...
3.


ELDERLY FEMALE VOICE
(V.O.)
Corn, sure. But dust. In your ears,
your mouth...

INSERT CUT: AN OLD-TIMER IN CLOSE UP, WATERY-EYED, DESCRIBES
DUST BOWL CONDITIONS.
OLD-TIMER
(V.O.)
Dust just everywhere. Everywhere.


EXT. COOPER’S FARM - MORNING
An old man, handkerchief across his face, sweeps dust out of
the door onto the porch. This is Grandpa (DONALD).


INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - MORNING
Cooper pours himself coffee as Donald puts grits on the
table. TOM, Cooper’s fifteen-year-old son, stuffs his face.

Murph, wet hair, towel around neck, plays with pieces of a
MODEL (a lunar lander).
DONALD
Not at the table, Murph.

MURPH
Dad, can you fix this?
COOPER
(takes pieces, frowning)
What’d you do to my lander?
MURPH
Wasn’t me.
TOM
Lemme guess - your ghost?
MURPH
It knocked it off my shelf. It
keeps knocking books off.

TOM
There’s no such things as ghosts,
dumb-ass -
4.


COOPER
(to Tom)
Hey -
MURPH
I looked it up, it’s called a
poltergeist.
TOM
Dad, tell her.

COOPER
Murph, you know that’s not
scientific.
MURPH
You say science is about admitting
what we don’t know.
DONALD
She’s got you there.
COOPER
(hands her pieces)
Start looking after our stuff.
Donald looks at Cooper, admonishing. Cooper shrugs.
COOPER
Fine. Murph, you wanna talk
science, don’t just tell me you’re
scared of some ghost - record the
facts, analyze, present your
conclusions.

MURPH
Sure.
Cooper gets up, grabs his keys.

DONALD
Hold up.
(Off look.)
Parent-teacher conferences.
’Parent’ - not ’grandparent’.


EXT. FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
The kids pile into an old pickup truck, scraping DUST off
the seats. Cooper, coffee in hand, peers at a black cloud.
5.


COOPER
Dust storm?
DONALD
(shakes his head)
Nelson’s torching his whole crop.

COOPER
Blight?
DONALD
They’re saying it’s the last
harvest for okra. Ever.
Cooper stares at the smoke. Uneasy. Gets into the truck.
COOPER
Shoulda planted corn like the rest
of us.
DONALD
Be nice to Miss Hanley. She’s
single.

COOPER
What’s that supposed to mean?
DONALD
Repopulating the Earth - start
pulling your weight.
COOPER
Start minding your business.


INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DIRT ROAD - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper sips his coffee, steering while Murph shifts -
COOPER
Okay, gimme second -

Murph wrestles the long gear stick into second. Cooper sips.
COOPER
Now third -

Murph struggles to find third - GRIND.
TOM
Find a gear, dumb-ass.
6.

MURPH
Shut up, Tom!

BANG - A TIRE BLOWS OUT. Cooper stops the truck.
TOM
What’d you do, Murph?
COOPER
She didn’t do anything. We lost a
tire is all.
TOM
Murphy’s Law.

MURPH
Shut up, Tom.
Cooper gets out of the truck, checks the flat, turns to Tom.
COOPER
Grab the spare.
TOM
That is the spare.
COOPER
Okay, patch kit.
TOM
How’m I supposed to patch it out
here?

COOPER
Figure it out. I’m not always going
to be here to help you.
Tom moves to the back of the truck. Murph is there.

MURPH
Why’d you and Mom name me after
something bad?
COOPER
We didn’t.
MURPH
Murphy’s Law?
COOPER
Murphy’s Law doesn’t mean bad stuff
will happen. It means ’whatever can
happen, will happen’. And that
sounded just fine to us.
7.

Murph frowns, hearing something ...
COOPER
What?
Then Cooper hears it, too. A LOW RUMBLE. Cooper GRABS Murph
as a DRONE SOARS low overhead -
COOPER
Come on!
Cooper jumps into the truck - he pulls out a laptop and
antenna hands them to Murph - shouts at Tom -
COOPER
Get in!
TOM
(jack in hand)
What about the tire?
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Drama"]

Summary A former pilot awakens from a nightmare about a plane crash. As his family grapples with the harsh conditions of the Dust Bowl, a mysterious drone appears overhead, leaving them with a sense of unease. Despite reassurances, the pilot's daughter remains fearful of ghosts, while his son dismisses her concerns. As they confront the realities of their drought-stricken community, the family's resilience is tested.
Strengths
  • Effective world-building
  • Intriguing setup of multiple storylines
  • Natural dialogue that reveals character dynamics
Weaknesses
  • Some cliched dialogue exchanges
  • Slightly predictable character interactions

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up multiple storylines and introduces intriguing elements that capture the audience's attention.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of blending science fiction with family drama in a rural setting is engaging and sets the stage for potential conflicts and character development.

Plot: 8

The plot is well-paced, introducing multiple story threads and building tension with the mysterious elements introduced.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh elements such as space travel and futuristic technology within a rural setting, creating a unique and original story. The characters' dialogue feels authentic and adds depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters are distinct and their relationships are established effectively through dialogue and actions.

Character Changes: 6

While there are no significant character changes in this scene, the groundwork is laid for potential growth and transformation.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to overcome his fear and trauma from a past crash, as seen in his nightmare and interactions with his daughter.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to deal with the challenges of farming life and provide for his family, as shown through his interactions with his children and father.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between characters, the potential ghost element, and the impending dust storm create tension and intrigue.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene, such as the protagonist's daughter's belief in ghosts and the challenges of farming life, adds complexity and conflict, keeping the audience on edge.

High Stakes: 8

The high stakes are established through the potential ghost presence, the impending dust storm, and the family dynamics at play.

Story Forward: 9

The scene effectively moves the story forward by introducing key elements and setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

The scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected transitions between space travel and rural life, creating tension and intrigue for the audience.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict between science and superstition, as the protagonist's daughter believes in ghosts while he emphasizes the importance of scientific analysis.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of unease and curiosity, setting the emotional tone for future developments.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is natural and reveals character dynamics and conflicts, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of high-stakes action, emotional family dynamics, and philosophical conflicts, keeping the audience invested in the characters and their struggles.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, balancing action-packed sequences with quieter character moments, creating a dynamic and engaging rhythm.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene is formatted correctly, with clear scene headings, dialogue, and action descriptions, following the expected format for a screenplay.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a well-defined setting, conflict, and resolution, fitting the expected format for a sci-fi drama.


Critique
  • The scene starts with a high-stakes situation of a young pilot fighting to control his craft in the stratosphere, which creates tension and intrigue for the audience.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and his children feels natural and establishes their relationships effectively.
  • The introduction of the dust storm and crop failure adds depth to the setting and hints at the larger challenges faced by the characters.
  • The use of the drone and laptop introduces a modern element to the scene and sets up potential conflicts or mysteries to be explored later in the script.
  • The concept of Murphy's Law is explained in a clear and relatable way, tying it back to the character's namesake.
  • The scene ends with a cliffhanger as a low rumble and a drone flying overhead create a sense of impending danger or mystery.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more sensory details to enhance the atmosphere of the scene, such as describing the sound of the drone or the feeling of the dust storm.
  • Explore deeper into the emotional dynamics between Cooper and his children to further develop their characters and relationships.
  • Think about foreshadowing or planting seeds for future plot points within this scene to create a sense of continuity and anticipation for the audience.
  • Consider tightening the pacing of the scene to maintain the tension and keep the audience engaged throughout.
  • Ensure that the resolution of the cliffhanger at the end of the scene leads smoothly into the next sequence, maintaining the momentum of the story.



Scene 2 -  Cooper's Determination and Murph's Curiosity
INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK THROUGH FIELDS - MOMENTS LATER
Close on the SHREDDING TIRE as the truck BARRELS through
cornfields. Murph fires up the laptop. Cooper strains to see
through the cornstalks, scanning the horizon -

TOM
There!
To the right, the dark shape of the drone, cruising low over
the fields. Cooper JERKS the wheel - the drone has long,
thin wings like a U-2, but no cockpit.
COOPER
Indian air force surveillance
drone. Solar cells could power an
entire farm.
(To Tom.)
Take the wheel -
Tom takes the wheel - Cooper hands Murph the antenna.

COOPER
Keep it pointed right at it -
Cooper works the laptop - the screen fills with Hindi.
Faster, Tom. I’m losing it.

Tom WEAVES through the corn - they round a corner, almost
HIT a HARVESTER - BANG - the truck loses a wing mirror -
Ahead the drone SOARS, banking, pulling away -
8.


The truck BURSTS out of the corn, Cooper’s nose is in the
laptop.
TOM
Dad?

COOPER
Almost got it. Don’t stop.
In front of them, the drone plummets from view into the next
valley - the path ahead leads to a three-hundred-foot drop.

TOM
DAD ...
Cooper looks up.

COOPER
Tom!
Tom locks up the brakes. Cooper looks at him - he shrugs.
TOM
You told me to keep going.
Cooper grabs the laptop and opens the door.
COOPER
Guess that answers the ’if I told
you to drive off a cliff’ scenario.
Murph is still pointing the antenna.
MURPH
We lost it.

COOPER
(smiles)
No, we didn’t.

The DRONE SOARS BACK OVER THEM - Cooper is moving his
fingers across the track pad, PILOTING THE DRONE.
As the kids watch, Cooper sends the drone soaring over them,
banking above the valley. Cooper crouches next to Murph.

COOPER
Want to give it a whirl?
Murph, guided by Cooper, moves her fingers across the track
pad - the massive drone BANKS in response. Murph is in
heaven.
9.


COOPER
Let’s set her down next to the
river.


EXT. RIVERBANK - MOMENTS LATER
The truck limps up to the drone. Cooper and the kids climb
down. Cooper runs a hand along the smooth carbon flank of
the aircraft.

TOM
How long you think it’s been up
there?
COOPER
Delhi mission control went down
same as ours, ten years ago.
TOM
It’s been up there ten years? Why’d
it come down so low?

COOPER
Sun finally cooked its brain. Or it
came down looking for something.
MURPH
What?

COOPER
Some kind of signal. Who knows?
Cooper finds an access hatch. Pries it open. Examines the
black-box brain of the machine.
MURPH
What are you going to do with it?
COOPER
Give it something socially
responsible to do, like drive a
combine.
MURPH
Couldn’t we just let it go? It’s
not hurting anyone.
Cooper looks down at his daughter. Good kid.
COOPER
This thing has to adapt, just like
the rest of us.
10.


EXT. COUNTY SCHOOL - DAY
The truck pulls up to school, drone fuselage hanging out.
COOPER
How’s this work? You guys come
with?
TOM
I’ve got class. But she ...

Pats Murph on shoulder.
Needs to wait.
Murph glares at Tom as he hops out.
COOPER
Why? What?
MURPH
Dad, I had a thing ... well,
they’ll tell you about it. Just try
and ...

COOPER
Am I gonna be mad?
MURPH
Not with me. Just try not to -

COOPER
Relax, I got this.
Murph pulls out a notebook. Starts drawing a BARCODE.


INT. PRINCIPAL’S OFFICE - LATER (MORNING)
Cooper enters, awkward. The PRINCIPAL (male, fifties) turns
from the window.

PRINCIPAL
Little late, Coop.
(Indicates chair.)
Guess you had to stop off at the
Asian fighter plane store.

COOPER
(sits, smiles)
Actually, sir, it’s a surveillance
drone. With outstanding solar
cells.
11.


Cooper nods at Murph’s teacher, Ms Hanley, thirties,
attractive.
PRINCIPAL
We got Tom’s scores back. He’s
going to make an excellent farmer.
Congratulations.
The Principal slides a paper across the desk.
COOPER
(taken aback)
What about college?
PRINCIPAL
The university only takes a
handful. They don’t have resources
-
COOPER
I’m still paying taxes - where’s
that go? There’s no more armies.

PRINCIPAL
Not to the university. Coop, you
have to be realistic.
COOPER
You’re ruling him out for college
now? He’s fifteen.
PRINCIPAL
Tom’s score simply isn’t high
enough.

COOPER
What’re you? About a
thirty-six-inch waist?
(Beat.)
Thirty-inch inseam?

PRINCIPAL
I’m not sure I see what -
COOPER
You’re telling me you need two
numbers to measure your own ass,
but just one to measure my son’s
future?
Ms Hanley stifles a laugh. The Principal shoots her a look.
12.


PRINCIPAL
You’re a well educated man, Coop. A
trained pilot -
COOPER
And an engineer.
PRINCIPAL
Okay. Well, right now the world
doesn’t need more engineers. We
didn’t run out of planes, or
television sets. We ran out of
food.
Cooper leans back. He’s not going to win this one.
PRINCIPAL
The world needs farmers. Good
farmers, like you. And Tom.
(Smiles benignly.)
We’re a caretaker generation. And
things are getting better. Maybe
your grandchildren -

COOPER
Are we done, sir?
PRINCIPAL
No. Ms Hanley is here to talk about
Murph.
Cooper shifts his gaze to Ms Hanley.
MS HANLEY
Murph’s a bright kid. A wonderful
kid, Mr Cooper. But she’s been
having a little trouble ...
Ms Hanley places a textbook on the desk.
She brought this to school, to show
the other kids the section on the
lunar landings ...
COOPER
Yeah, it’s one of my old textbooks,
she likes the pictures.

MS HANLEY
This is an old federal textbook.
We’ve replaced them with corrected
versions.
13.


COOPER
Corrected?
MS HANLEY
Explaining how the Apollo missions
were faked to bankrupt the Soviet
Union.
COOPER
You don’t believe we went to the
moon?

MS HANLEY
(tolerant smile)
I believe it was a brilliant piece
of propaganda. The Soviets
bankrupted themselves pouring
resources into rockets and other
useless machines.
COOPER
’Useless machines’?

MS HANLEY
Yes, Mr Cooper. And if we don’t
want a repeat of the wastefulness
and excess of the twentieth
century, our children need to learn
about this planet, not tales of
leaving it.
Cooper considers this in silence. Looks at Ms Hanley.
COOPER
One of those useless machines they
used to make was called an MRI. And
if we had any of them left, the
doctors might have been able to
find the cyst in my wife’s brain
before she died, rather than
afterwards. Then she could be
sitting here listening to this,
which’d be good, cos she was always
the calmer one ...
Ms Hanley looks at Cooper, embarrassed. Then -

MS HANLEY
I’m sorry about your wife, Mr
Cooper. But Murph got into a fist
fight with several of her
classmates over this Apollo
nonsense and we thought it best to
(MORE)
14.


MS HANLEY (cont’d)
bring you in and see what ideas you
might have for dealing with her
behavior on the home front.

COOPER
Sure. Well, there’s a ball game
tomorrow night, and Murph’s going
through a bit of a baseball phase.
There’ll be candy and soda ...

Ms Hanley looks at him, expectant.
COOPER
I think I’ll take her to that.
Ms Hanley turns to the Principal, not happy.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper and his children pursue a drone, leading to Cooper piloting it and planning to repurpose it. Murph's passion for space conflicts with her teacher, resulting in a fist fight and a suggestion to take her to a baseball game.
Strengths
  • Engaging dialogue
  • Complex characters
  • Tension-filled conflict
  • Exploration of themes
Weaknesses
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue
  • Lack of significant character development in this scene

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends multiple genres and tones, creating a compelling and emotionally resonant narrative. The dialogue is sharp and engaging, driving the conflict forward and revealing important character dynamics.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a futuristic drone encounter in a rural setting is unique and intriguing. It explores themes of technological progress, education, and the impact of past events on the present.

Plot: 8

The plot is well-developed, with a clear progression of events that build tension and reveal character motivations. The conflict between Cooper and the school officials adds depth to the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the clash between technology and tradition, with authentic character interactions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are complex and well-defined, with distinct personalities and conflicting goals. Their interactions drive the story forward and provide insight into their relationships.

Character Changes: 7

While there is not a significant character change within this scene, the interactions and conflicts set the stage for potential growth and development in future scenes.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to prove his worth and adaptability in a changing world, as seen in his interactions with the drone and his daughter.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to capture and pilot the drone, showcasing his skills and resourcefulness.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Cooper and the school officials, as well as the internal conflict within Cooper himself, adds depth and tension to the scene. The characters' conflicting goals create a sense of urgency and drama.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create tension and conflict, but not overwhelming to the point of overshadowing the character dynamics.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high for the characters, as they face challenges related to education, family dynamics, and the future of their farm. The decisions made in this scene could have long-lasting consequences.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new conflicts, deepening character relationships, and setting up future plot developments. It provides important information about the characters' motivations and goals.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is somewhat predictable in its outcome, but the character dynamics and philosophical conflicts add layers of unpredictability.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the value of technology and progress versus traditional values and beliefs, as seen in Cooper's interactions with the drone and his daughter's teacher.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension and frustration to sadness and hope. The characters' struggles and the themes of loss and adaptation resonate with the audience.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is sharp, engaging, and reveals important information about the characters and their motivations. It effectively conveys tension, emotion, and conflict.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its mix of action, humor, and emotional depth, keeping the audience invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective, balancing action with dialogue and character development to keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows standard formatting for its genre, making it easy to follow and visualize.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-paced action and dialogue, fitting the genre expectations.


Critique
  • The scene starts with a high-energy chase sequence involving the family pursuing a drone through cornfields, which feels disconnected from the previous emotional and introspective moments in the script.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and the Principal feels forced and lacks subtlety, with the Principal's lines coming off as overly expository and lacking nuance.
  • The conflict between Cooper and the Principal about Tom's future is resolved too quickly and neatly, missing an opportunity to delve deeper into the complexities of education and career choices.
  • The interaction between Cooper and Ms Hanley regarding Murph's behavior at school feels contrived and the dialogue comes off as heavy-handed in conveying the themes of education and propaganda.
  • The transition from the intense chase scene to the school meeting feels abrupt and disjointed, lacking a smooth flow between the two contrasting scenarios.
Suggestions
  • Consider toning down the action in the chase scene to better align with the overall tone of the script and maintain consistency in pacing.
  • Rewrite the dialogue between Cooper and the Principal to add more depth and subtlety, allowing for a more nuanced exploration of the themes of education and career choices.
  • Extend the conflict between Cooper and the Principal to create more tension and provide a more satisfying resolution that reflects the complexities of the situation.
  • Refine the interaction between Cooper and Ms Hanley to make the dialogue more natural and realistic, avoiding heavy-handed exposition and focusing on character dynamics.
  • Work on smoother transitions between scenes to ensure a cohesive narrative flow and maintain the emotional resonance of the script.



Scene 3 -  Strange Harvesters and Mysterious Books
EXT. PICKUP TRUCK OUTSIDE SCHOOL - MOMENTS LATER
Murph looks up from her notebook at her dad, expectantly.

MURPH
How’d it go?
COOPER
I, uh ... got you suspended.

MURPH
What?!
COOPER
Sorry.

MURPH
Dad! I told you not to -
The CB radio CRACKLES to life.

CB OPERATOR
Cooper? Boots for Cooper.
COOPER
Cooper.

BOOTS
(over radio)
Coop, those combines you rebuilt
went haywire.
15.


COOPER
Power the controllers down for a
couple minutes.
BOOTS
(over radio)
Did that. You should come take a
look, it’s kinda weird.

EXT. FARMHOUSE - DAY

Cooper and Murph pass a slow-moving harvester pulling up to
the house, which is surrounded by AUTOMATED FARM MACHINES.
They’ve nosed up to the house like animals at a Nativity.
Boots, the farm hand, approaches -

BOOTS
One by one they been peeling off
from the fields and heading over.
Cooper pops open the cabin to a harvester. Checks the auto
pilot hooked up to the controls.

BOOTS
Something’s interfering with their
compass ...
Cooper jumps down and heads to the front door. Enters.

BOOTS (O.S.)
Magnetism or some such ...


INT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks at the kitchen. Nothing. Murph comes in.
MURPH
What is it, Dad?

A small BANG from upstairs. Cooper heads up.

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS

Murph’s bedroom clearly used to be her mother’s. Cooper, in
the doorway, looks at the wall of BOOKS opposite - several
GAPS. He looks down at some books on the floor.
MURPH
Nothing special about which books.
(Off look.)
(MORE)
16.


MURPH (cont’d)
Been working on it, like you said.
Murph holds up her notebook with its barcode.
MURPH
I counted the spaces.
COOPER
Why?

MURPH
In case the ghost’s trying to say
something. I’m trying Morse.
COOPER
Morse?

MURPH
Yeah. Dots and dashes, used for -
COOPER
Murph, I know what Morse code is. I
just don’t think your bookshelf’s
trying to talk to you.
He leaves. Murph, embarrassed, turns back to the shelf.
Genres: ["Drama","Sci-Fi"]

Summary A phone call alerts Cooper to malfunctioning harvesters heading towards the house. Meanwhile, Murph unveils a bookshelf with intentional gaps, attempting to interpret them as Morse code.
Strengths
  • Intriguing concept of a ghostly mystery
  • Emotional depth in character interactions
  • Effective blend of genres
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more concise
  • Transition between scenes could be smoother

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds tension and mystery while also delving into the emotional dynamics between the characters. The introduction of the ghostly mystery adds depth to the plot.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a potential ghostly presence through Morse code and investigation is innovative and engaging. It adds a layer of intrigue to the scene.

Plot: 7

The plot advances through the investigation of the ghostly mystery and the family dynamics surrounding it. The scene sets up future conflicts and developments effectively.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a unique blend of technological and supernatural elements, such as the use of Morse code to communicate with a ghost, adding a fresh twist to the familiar theme of loss and connection.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Cooper and Murph, are well-developed and their interactions reveal underlying tensions and emotions. The scene deepens the audience's understanding of the characters.

Character Changes: 7

Murph's curiosity and determination to solve the mystery, as well as Cooper's skepticism and eventual willingness to investigate, show subtle character changes that hint at future developments.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal is to understand the mysterious occurrences happening on the farm and to connect with her deceased mother through Morse code. This reflects her desire for connection and understanding in the face of loss.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to investigate the malfunctioning farm machines and solve the problem. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in maintaining the farm's operations.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There are multiple layers of conflict present in the scene, including the family tensions, the investigation of the ghostly presence, and the challenges on the farm. These conflicts drive the narrative forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the challenge of solving the malfunctioning farm machines and the conflict between belief in the supernatural and skepticism.

High Stakes: 6

While the stakes are not immediately life-threatening, the emotional and personal stakes for the characters are high. The resolution of the ghostly mystery and the family tensions have significant implications.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by introducing the ghostly mystery, deepening the family dynamics, and setting up future conflicts and resolutions. It propels the narrative in a compelling direction.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twist of using Morse code to communicate with a ghost, adding a layer of mystery and intrigue.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around belief in the supernatural or paranormal. Murph believes that the ghost of her mother is trying to communicate with her through Morse code, while Cooper is more skeptical and rational in his approach.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from tension and curiosity to embarrassment and concern. The emotional depth adds richness to the storytelling.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotions and conflicts between the characters. It also introduces elements of mystery and intrigue through the discussion of Morse code and the ghostly presence.

Engagement: 8

This scene is engaging because of the mystery surrounding the malfunctioning farm machines and Murph's attempt to communicate with her deceased mother.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a gradual reveal of the mysterious occurrences on the farm.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character actions and dialogue that advance the plot and reveal character motivations.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition from the previous scene, making it feel disjointed and abrupt.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Murph feels forced and lacks depth, missing an opportunity to explore their relationship further.
  • The conflict with the automated farm machines going haywire is introduced but not fully developed or resolved in this scene, leaving it feeling unresolved.
  • The use of Morse code and the ghostly element in Murph's attempts to communicate with the bookshelf could be intriguing but needs more context and development to be fully engaging.
  • The scene lacks a strong emotional impact or a clear sense of purpose, making it feel like a filler rather than a meaningful progression of the story.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scene to establish continuity and flow in the narrative.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Cooper and Murph to delve deeper into their relationship dynamics and provide more insight into their characters.
  • Develop the conflict with the automated farm machines further to create tension and drive the plot forward in a more engaging way.
  • Provide more context and background for Murph's Morse code communication attempts to make it a more integral part of the story.
  • Add emotional depth and purpose to the scene to make it more impactful and meaningful in the overall story arc.



Scene 4 -  Interrogation at the Secret Facility
INT. FRONT PORCH, FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
Donald hands Cooper a beer.
COOPER
Had to reset every compass clock
and GPS to offset for the anomaly.
DONALD
Which is?

COOPER
No idea. If the house was built on
magnetic ore, we’d’ve seen this the
first time we switched on a
tractor.

Donald nods. Sips.
DONALD
Sounds like your meeting at school
didn’t go so well.
17.


COOPER
(sighs)
We’ve forgotten who we are, Donald.
Explorers, pioneers. Not
caretakers.

Donald nods, thoughtful. Weighs up his words.
DONALD
When I was a kid it felt like they
made something new every day. Some
gadget or idea. Like every day was
Christmas. But six billion people
... just try to imagine that. And
every last one of them trying to
have it all.

He turns to Cooper.
This world isn’t so bad. And Tom’ll
do just fine - you’re the one who
doesn’t belong. Born forty years
too late, or forty years too early.
My daughter knew it, God bless her.
And your kids know it. ’Specially
Murph.
COOPER
We used to look up and wonder at
our place in the stars. Now we just
look down and worry about our place
in the dirt.
DONALD
Cooper, you were good at something
and you never got a chance to do
anything with it. I’m sorry. But
that’s not your kids’ fault.
Cooper looks up at the stars above.

OLD-TIMER (V.O.)
May 14th. Never forget. Clear as a
bell. You’d never think ...
INSERT CUT: THE OLD-TIMER REMEMBERS. CUT TO A SECOND
OLD-TIMER ...

SECOND OLD-TIMER
When the first of the real big ones
rolled in ... I thought it was the
end of the world.
18.


EXT. BASEBALL FIELD - LATE AFTERNOON
The CRACK of ball off bat - a pop-fly caught to a trickle of
applause. Half-filled stands at what looks like a minor
league game.

DONALD
In my day we had real ball players.
Who’re these bums?
As the team runs in from the field we see: NEW YORK YANKEES.

COOPER
Well, in my day people were too
busy fighting over food for
baseball, so consider this
progress.

Murph offers Donald some popcorn.
DONALD
Fine. But popcorn at a ball game is
unnatural. I want a hot dog.

MURPH
(confused)
What’s a hot dog?
Cooper sits with Tom a row in front.

COOPER
The school says you’re gonna follow
in my footsteps. I think that’s
great.

TOM
You think that’s great?
MURPH
You hate farming, Dad. Grandpa
said.

Cooper looks at Donald, who shrugs ’sorry’.
COOPER
What’s important is how you feel
about it, Tom.
TOM
I like what you do. I like our
farm.
19.


On the field: the batter hits one along the ground - it
rolls to an infielder’s foot - but the infielder IGNORES it,
STARING up at the sky. The crowd starts to look up ...
OLD-TIMER (V.O.)
You’ve never seen the like. Black.
Just black ...
INSERT CUT: THE OLD-TIMER CHOKES BACK FEAR AS HE REMEMBERS.
Cooper stares at the horizon, where an ENORMOUS BLACK DUST
STORM IS MASSING. People start leaving, tying handkerchiefs
across their faces.
COOPER
Come on, guys.


INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper speeds along as Donald and the kids stuff RAGS into
cracks and vents ... behind them the WALL OF BLACK DUST
ADVANCES, SWALLOWING UP ROADS, BUILDINGS. A nasty SOUND is
developing - the truck ROCKING with GUSTS of wind ...
Suddenly, BLACK DUST ENVELOPS the car, LIGHTNING CRACKLING.
DONALD
It’s a bad one ...

COOPER
Mask up, guys.
Murph and Tom take SURGICAL MASKS out of the glove box.


EXT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
VISIBILITY MERE FEET as the dust storm BRUTALIZES the farm.
The truck CRAWLS up to the house. Cooper leans in to try and
see better ... CRACK - a panel of sheet metal SMASHES into
the windshield - Cooper turns - wrestles Murph out of the
truck as Donald blindly stumbles towards the front door with
Tom ...


INT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
The SHUTTERS BANG as the wind WHIPS around the house,
FORCING JETS OF DUST up through cracks in the window frames,
floorboards ... Donald SLAMS the door. Murph is COUGHING ...
Cooper looks around. Sees dust coming from upstairs.
20.


COOPER
Did you both shut your windows?
Tom nods. Murph looks at Cooper. Runs for the stairs.
COOPER
Wait -

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS

Cooper gets to the doorway. Murph stands in the middle of
the room, STARING. Cooper SHUTS the window. The dust hangs
in the relative quiet. Murph is staring, TRANSFIXED, at
LINES where dust is FALLING UNNATURALLY FAST, STREAMING DOWN
through the air, collecting on the floor in a PATTERN -

MURPH
The Ghost.
Cooper STARES at dust collecting like snow on power lines...
COOPER
Grab your pillow, sleep in with
Tom.

EXT. FARMHOUSE - DAWN - MORNING

Calm. Dust settled.

INT. TOM’S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Murph slips out of bed, wrapped in her blanket. Pads down
the hall, peeks in her bedroom door at -

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
Cooper sits, staring at the PATTERN of dust: thick radial
lines, like a CIRCULAR BARCODE. Murph sits down next to her
dad. They STARE at it together. He holds up a coin ...
COOPER
It’s not a ghost ...

Cooper tosses the coin across a line. It SHOOTS at the floor
-
It’s gravity.
21.


INT. SAME - LATER
Donald pokes his head in.
DONALD
I’m dropping Tom, then heading to
town ...
(Looks at dust pattern.)
You wanna clean that up when you’ve
finished praying to it?

Cooper reaches for Murph’s notebook. Starts writing ...

INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - LATER
Murph fills a glass of water. Picks up a plate of
sandwiches.

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
Follow Murph into the room, to find Cooper standing there.

COOPER
I got something.
Cooper is pointing to the thick and thin radial lines -
Binary. Thick is one, thin is zero
- it’s numbers ... number pairs...
He holds up the notebook to show Murph the number pairs.
Coordinates.


INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper and Murph pore over MAPS. Cooper TOSSES one aside,
lays it out on the table. Finds a spot. Looks up at Murph
...


EXT. FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper packing his truck - sleeping bag, flashlight ...
MURPH
You can’t leave me behind!
COOPER
Grandpa’s back in two hours.
22.


MURPH
You don’t know what you’re going to
find -
COOPER
That’s why I can’t take you.

INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper grabs the maps and a bottle of water. He calls up -

COOPER
Murph?
Nothing.
Murph, just wait here for Grandpa.
Tell him I’ll call him on the
radio.

INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON ROAD - MOMENTS LATER

Cooper drives, map spread on the wheel, looks for a pen -
reaches over to the passenger wheel well - lifts a BLANKET -
Murph is there -
COOPER
JESUS!

The truck WOBBLES as Cooper regains control.
Murph, what are you doing?!
Murph is LAUGHING as she climbs into the passenger seat -

COOPER
It’s not funny -
But Murph’s laugh is infectious.

MURPH
You wouldn’t be here if it wasn’t
for me.
Cooper hands Murph the map.

COOPER
Fair enough. Make yourself
useful...
The pickup cruises down the road, heading for the MOUNTAINS.
23.


EXT. PLAINS APPROACHING MOUNTAINS - DUSK
The tiny pickup is dwarfed by the darkening foothills.

EXT. DIRT ROAD OFF MOUNTAIN PASS - NIGHT

Cooper pulls up to a gate in chain-link fence. Murph is
asleep next to him.
COOPER
Murph. Murph.
Murph wakes.
I think this is as far as we get.
Murph glances out at the fence. Closes her eyes again.

MURPH
Why? You didn’t bring the
bolt-cutters?
COOPER
I like your spirit, young lady.
Cooper gets out of the truck, retrieves his bolt-cutters and
comes up to the fence. He looks up and down the road.
Nothing. He reaches out and puts the jaws of the cutters -

WHAM! SPOTLIGHTS IN COOPER’S EYES - A HARSH ELECTRIC VOICE -
VOICE
STEP AWAY FROM THE FENCE.
Cooper drops the cutters, puts his hands in the air -

COOPER
Don’t shoot! My child is in the
car! I’m unarmed! My daughter is -
Murph watches, terrified as, with a ZAP, Cooper DROPS. Murph
SCRAMBLES back along the seat as MASSIVE FOOTSTEPS APPROACH.
The door is WRENCHED open - a BLINDING LIGHT
VOICE
DON’T BE AFRAID.

Murph SCREAMS.
24.


INT. BRIGHT, INDUSTRIAL ROOM - LATER
Cooper comes to, sitting in a chair. Opposite him is an
ARTICULATED MACHINE. A VOICE emanates from its side.
MACHINE
How did you find this place?
COOPER
Where’s my daughter?

MACHINE
You had the coordinates for this
facility marked on your map. Where
did you get them?
Cooper leans in to the machine.

COOPER
WHERE’S MY DAUGHTER?!
Cooper’s scream REVERBERATES. Cooper sizes up the machine.
You might think you’re still in the
Marines, but the Marines don’t
exist anymore, pal. I’ve got grunts
like you mowing my grass ...
The Machine RISES to its full height.

MACHINE
How did you find us?
COOPER
But you don’t look like a lawnmower
to me ... you, I’m gonna turn into
an overqualified vacuum cleaner -
FEMALE VOICE (O.S.)
No, you’re not.

Cooper turns to see a businesslike woman in her thirties.
WOMAN
Tars, back down, please.
The machine, TARS, sinks back down.

COOPER
You’re taking a risk using
ex-military for security. They’re
old, their control units are
unpredictable ...
25.


WOMAN
Well, that’s what the government
could spare.
COOPER
Who are you?
WOMAN
Dr Brand.
COOPER
I knew a Dr Brand once. But he was
a professor -
WOMAN (BRAND)
What makes you think I’m not?

COOPER
And nowhere near as cute.
BRAND
You think you can flirt your way
out of this mess?

COOPER
(honest, scared)
Dr Brand, I have no idea what this
mess is. I’m scared for my little
girl and I want her by my side.
Then I’ll tell you anything you
want to know. Okay?
Brand considers this. Turns to Tars.
BRAND
Get the principals and the girl
into the conference room.
(To Cooper.)
Your daughter’s fine. Bright kid.
(Rises.)
Must have a very smart mother.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper and his daughter discover hidden coordinates, leading them to a secret facility. Upon discovery, they are detained and questioned by Dr. Brand and Tars. Tension arises as Cooper fears for his daughter's safety, but Dr. Brand assures him that she is unharmed. Dr. Brand agrees to listen to Cooper's account, and the scene concludes with them being directed to a conference room.
Strengths
  • Tension-building
  • Emotional depth
  • Intriguing developments
  • Compelling dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more concise
  • Character motivations could be clearer in some instances

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively builds tension, introduces new elements to the story, and keeps the audience engaged with its emotional depth and intriguing developments.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a mysterious facility and the aftermath of a dust storm adds depth to the story and raises questions that keep the audience curious.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the introduction of the facility and the characters' reactions to the unfolding events, keeping the audience invested in the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique elements such as the dust storm, mysterious coordinates, and technological anomalies, creating a fresh and intriguing narrative. The characters' dialogue feels authentic and reflective of their internal struggles.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters show depth and emotion, especially in the father-daughter dynamic, adding layers to the scene and making the audience empathize with their situation.

Character Changes: 7

The characters, especially the father, undergo changes in their perceptions and actions due to the unfolding events, adding depth to their arcs and the overall story.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to reconnect with his sense of purpose and identity as an explorer and pioneer, rather than just a caretaker. He is grappling with feelings of being out of place and unfulfilled in his current role.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to protect his daughter, Murph, and ensure her safety in the face of the dust storm and mysterious events happening around them.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the characters' desires, the mysterious facility, and the aftermath of the dust storm creates tension and keeps the audience on edge.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with external challenges like the dust storm and mysterious events, as well as internal conflicts between the characters' beliefs and values.

High Stakes: 8

The high stakes of the scene, including the safety of the characters, the mystery of the facility, and the aftermath of the dust storm, create a sense of urgency and danger.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by introducing new elements, raising questions, and advancing the plot in a compelling way.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the sudden dust storm, mysterious coordinates, and unexpected events that challenge the characters' beliefs and actions.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of progress and innovation versus stagnation and complacency. Cooper and Donald discuss the changing world and the loss of a sense of wonder and exploration.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The emotional impact of the scene is significant, especially in the father-daughter relationship and the uncertainty they face, evoking fear, hope, and curiosity in the audience.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the characters' emotions, motivations, and the unfolding mystery, keeping the audience engaged and interested in the story.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of mystery, tension, and emotional depth. The characters' interactions and the unfolding events keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is standard for its genre, with clear scene headings and descriptions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-paced dialogue and action sequences. It effectively builds tension and mystery.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition between the previous scene and the current one, making it feel disjointed.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Donald feels forced and lacks depth, making it difficult for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The conflict between Cooper and Donald about the meeting at school is not fully explored or resolved, leaving the audience with unanswered questions.
  • The introduction of the dust storm and the subsequent actions taken by the characters feel rushed and lack proper build-up, diminishing the impact of the storm.
  • The interaction between Cooper and Murph in her bedroom lacks emotional depth and fails to effectively convey the gravity of the situation they are facing.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Murph about the dust pattern and Morse code feels contrived and unrealistic, detracting from the authenticity of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scene to this one to improve the flow of the screenplay.
  • Develop the dialogue between Cooper and Donald to make it more engaging and meaningful, allowing the audience to connect with the characters on a deeper level.
  • Explore the conflict between Cooper and Donald further to add depth and complexity to their relationship.
  • Build up the tension and suspense surrounding the dust storm to create a more impactful and dramatic scene.
  • Enhance the emotional connection between Cooper and Murph in her bedroom to convey the gravity of the situation they are facing more effectively.
  • Revise the dialogue between Cooper and Murph to make it more authentic and realistic, ensuring that it resonates with the audience.



Scene 5 -  Unexpected Encounter at the Underground Facility
INT. UNDERGROUND FACILITY - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper follows Brand into a corridor. Tars LURCHES behind.

COOPER
It’s pretty clear you don’t want
visitors - why not let us back up
from your fence and be on our way?
26.


BRAND
It’s not that simple.
COOPER
Sure it is. I don’t know anything
about you or this place.

BRAND
Yes, you do.
Brand ushers Cooper through a door into a conference room -


INT. CONFERENCE ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Where an OLD MAN is crouched down, talking to Murph.

MURPH
Dad!
Murph runs into Cooper’s arms. The Old Man SMILES at Cooper.
OLD MAN
Hello, Cooper.
COOPER
(stunned)
Professor Brand?

MAN AT TABLE (DOYLE)
Just take a seat, Mr Cooper.
Cooper and Murph sit at a table where five people are
waiting - a bespectacled man, WILLIAMS, leans forward to
address Cooper.

WILLIAMS
Explain how you found this
facility.
COOPER
Stumbled across it. Looking for
salvage and I saw the fence -
WILLIAMS
You’re sitting in the world’s best
kept secret - you don’t stumble in.
And you certainly don’t stumble
out.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Cooper, please. Cooperate with
these people.
27.


Cooper looks nervously around the room.
COOPER
It’s hard to explain, but we
learned these coordinates from an
anomaly ...

DOYLE
What sort of anomaly?
COOPER
I don’t want to term it
’supernatural’ ... but ...
Cooper is losing them. Williams leans forward. Serious.
WILLIAMS
You’re going to have to, Mr Cooper.
Real quick.
COOPER
After that last storm, it was a
pattern ... in dust ...

MURPH
It was gravity.
All eyes turn to Murph. She’s said the magic word. Doyle
looks at Professor Brand, excited. Turns to Cooper -

DOYLE
Where was this gravitational
anomaly?
COOPER
Look, I’m happy you’re excited
about gravity, but if you want more
answers from us I’m gonna need
assurances -

WILLIAMS
Assurances?
Cooper looks at Murph. Then covers Murph’s ears.
COOPER
That we’re getting out of here ...
and not in the trunk of some car.
Brand laughs. Williams smiles. Cooper looks confused.
28.


PROFESSOR BRAND
Don’t you know who we are, Coop?
COOPER
No. No, I don’t.

BRAND
(points around table)
Williams, Doyle, Jenkins, Smith,
you already know my father,
Professor Brand. We’re NASA.

COOPER
NASA?
PROFESSOR BRAND
NASA. Same NASA you flew for.

Now Cooper is laughing, too. Murph looks around, confused.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper and Brand stumble upon a secret underground facility and are interrogated by its occupants. Cooper's quick wit and resourceful nature lead to the revelation that they are NASA members and have a connection to Professor Brand. The tense atmosphere transforms into one of camaraderie as the true identities of the questioners are unveiled, leaving a trail of laughter and newfound understanding.
Strengths
  • Engaging plot twist
  • Realistic character reactions
  • Tense and mysterious tone
Weaknesses
  • Some confusion in dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is engaging, introduces a significant plot development, and keeps the audience intrigued with the revelation of the characters' connection to NASA.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the characters being involved with NASA adds depth and complexity to the story, opening up new possibilities and avenues for exploration.

Plot: 8

The plot takes a significant turn with the introduction of NASA, adding layers of mystery and intrigue to the narrative.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the classic 'secret facility' trope by blending elements of mystery, humor, and philosophical conflict. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and add depth to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters react realistically to the revelation, showcasing their curiosity, confusion, and skepticism, which adds depth to their personalities.

Character Changes: 6

The characters experience a shift in their understanding of the world and their place in it, as they come to terms with the revelation of their connection to NASA.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to understand the true nature of the facility and the people he is dealing with. This reflects his curiosity, skepticism, and desire for answers.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to ensure his and his daughter's safety while navigating the unknown situation they find themselves in. This reflects the immediate challenge of being in a secretive facility with unknown intentions.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict arises from the characters' discovery of the secret NASA facility and their interactions with the NASA personnel, adding tension and intrigue to the scene.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting goals, hidden agendas, and power struggles between the characters. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome, adding to the suspense.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are raised with the characters' discovery of the secret NASA facility, as they navigate the implications of their connection to NASA and the mysteries surrounding the facility.

Story Forward: 8

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a major plot twist and setting the stage for further exploration of space-related themes and the characters' involvement with NASA.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the shifting power dynamics, unexpected revelations, and ambiguous motives of the characters. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between the protagonist's skepticism and the organization's need for secrecy and control. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about trust and transparency.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a range of emotions, including confusion, excitement, and curiosity, as the characters grapple with the revelation of their connection to NASA.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is engaging, with a mix of tension, excitement, and seriousness, reflecting the characters' emotions and the gravity of the situation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced dialogue, intriguing premise, and dynamic character interactions. The audience is drawn into the mystery and tension of the situation.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with well-timed reveals and character interactions. The rhythm of the dialogue keeps the audience engaged and invested in the unfolding events.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. It adheres to industry standards for screenplay formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character introductions, rising tension, and a cliffhanger ending that propels the story forward.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency or tension, considering the gravity of the situation and the secretive nature of the facility.
  • The dialogue feels a bit too casual and lacks the necessary gravitas for a scene involving a top-secret NASA facility and a gravitational anomaly.
  • The transition from Cooper being apprehensive to suddenly laughing and being familiar with NASA feels abrupt and unrealistic.
  • The interaction between Cooper and the NASA officials could be more dynamic and intense to heighten the stakes and create a sense of mystery and intrigue.
  • The reveal of the characters being from NASA could be more impactful and surprising, rather than being treated as a casual revelation.
Suggestions
  • Add more tension and suspense to the scene by emphasizing the secretive and high-stakes nature of the facility and the anomaly.
  • Revise the dialogue to be more serious and cryptic, reflecting the mysterious and clandestine setting of the scene.
  • Consider building up the reveal of the characters being from NASA to create a more dramatic and surprising moment.
  • Explore the dynamics between Cooper and the NASA officials to create a more engaging and intriguing interaction.
  • Enhance the atmosphere of the scene by incorporating subtle hints and clues that lead to the eventual reveal of the characters' true identities.



Scene 6 -  The Last Frontier
INT. UNDERGROUND FACILITY - MOMENTS LATER

Professor Brand shows Cooper the facility.
COOPER
I heard you got shut down for
refusing to drop bombs from the
stratosphere onto starving people.

PROFESSOR BRAND
When they realized killing other
people wasn’t a long term solution
they needed us back. Set us up in
the old NORAD facility. In secret.

COOPER
Why secret?
PROFESSOR BRAND
Public opinion won’t allow spending
on space exploration. Not when
we’re struggling to put food on the
table.
Professor Brand ushers Cooper through a large door -
29.


INT. GREENHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
Professor Brand gestures to large PLANTATIONS under glass.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Blight. Wheat seven years ago, okra
this year. Now there’s just corn.
COOPER
But we’re growing more than ever -

PROFESSOR BRAND
Like the potatoes in Ireland, like
the wheat in the dust bowl, the
corn will die. Soon.
Brand enters with Murph. She shows her the greenhouses.

COOPER
We’ll find a way, we always have.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Driven by the unshakable faith that
the Earth is ours.
COOPER
Not just ours, but it is our home.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Earth’s atmosphere is 80 percent
nitrogen. We don’t even breathe
nitrogen.
Professor Brand shows him a blighted stalk.
Blight does. And as it thrives our
air contains less and less oxygen
...
Professor Brand gestures over at Murph ...
The last people to starve will be
the first to suffocate. Your
daughter’s generation will be the
last to survive on Earth.
Cooper looks over at Murph. Then back to Professor Brand.

COOPER
Tell me this is where you explain
how you’re going to save the world.
30.


INT. VAST CIRCULAR CHAMBER (LAUNCH FACILITY) - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper and Professor Brand enter like ants in a grain silo.
A ROCKET is on a pad, DWARFED by the circular chamber. Far
above, a ring of mirrors reflects the dawn down into the
facility.

PROFESSOR BRAND
We’re not meant to save the world
... we’re meant to leave it.

Cooper stares up at the rocket. He recognizes the
arrangement of two CRAFT at the top.
COOPER
Rangers.

PROFESSOR BRAND
The last components of our one
versatile ship in orbit, the
Endurance. Our final expedition.
COOPER
What happened to the other
vehicles?
PROFESSOR BRAND
The Lazarus missions.

COOPER
Sounds cheerful.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Lazarus came back from the dead -

COOPER
He had to die in the first place.
You sent people out there looking
for a new home ...

Professor Brand nods.
There’s no planet in our solar
system that can support life ...
and it’d take them a thousand years
to reach the nearest star - that
doesn’t even qualify as futile ...
Where did you send them, Professor?
PROFESSOR BRAND
Cooper, I can’t tell you any more
unless you agree to pilot this
craft. You’re the best we ever had.
31.

COOPER
I barely left the stratosphere.

PROFESSOR BRAND
This crew’s never left the
simulator. We can’t program this
mission from Earth, we don’t know
what’s out there. We need a pilot.
And this is the mission you were
trained for.
COOPER
Without ever knowing. An hour ago,
you didn’t even know I was still
alive. And you were going anyway.

PROFESSOR BRAND
We had no choice. But something
brought you here. They chose you.
COOPER
Who’s ’they’?
Professor Brand is silent. Cooper wrestles.
How long would I be gone?
PROFESSOR BRAND
Hard to know. Years.
COOPER
I’ve got my kids, Professor.

PROFESSOR BRAND
Get out there and save them.
Cooper considers this. Decides.
COOPER
Who’s ’they’?
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In the face of a devastating blight, Professor Brand unveils a secret plan to abandon Earth aboard a spacecraft, the Endurance. Despite his initial hesitation, Cooper, the chosen pilot, accepts the mission, driven by a desperate hope to secure his children's future.
Strengths
  • Compelling concept
  • Thought-provoking dialogue
  • High stakes
Weaknesses
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue
  • Lack of action

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the high stakes and moral complexities of the story, engaging the audience with its philosophical and thought-provoking dialogue.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of humanity facing extinction on Earth and the need to find a new home in space is a compelling and original idea that drives the narrative forward.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly as the characters are introduced to the secret facility and the mission to leave Earth. The tension and conflict are heightened, setting up the central conflict of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the sci-fi genre by focusing on the human drama and ethical dilemmas of space exploration. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth and complexity to the narrative.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters, especially Cooper and Professor Brand, are well-developed and their motivations are clear. The scene focuses on their internal struggles and decisions, adding depth to the story.

Character Changes: 7

Cooper faces a significant decision that could change the course of his life and the fate of humanity, showing growth and development in his character.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to reconcile his desire to stay with his family on Earth with the opportunity to potentially save them by piloting a mission to find a new habitable planet. This reflects his deeper need for connection and protection of his loved ones.

External Goal: 8

Cooper's external goal is to understand the mission he is being asked to undertake and to make a decision about whether or not to pilot the craft. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in balancing his personal responsibilities with the opportunity to save humanity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict between staying on Earth and venturing into space, as well as the personal conflicts of the characters, adds tension and drama to the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and moral dilemmas creating obstacles for the characters to overcome. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome, adding to the tension and drama.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are incredibly high as humanity faces extinction on Earth, forcing the characters to make difficult decisions about their future.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing the mission to leave Earth, setting up the central conflict and raising the stakes for the characters.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' choices and the moral dilemmas they face. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the situation will resolve.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the ethical implications of leaving Earth behind to find a new home. Cooper grapples with the idea of sacrificing his present for a future that may or may not exist, while Professor Brand believes in the necessity of leaving Earth to ensure the survival of the human race.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of concern and hope for the characters' future, as well as the fate of humanity. The emotional stakes are high, drawing the audience in.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is thought-provoking and philosophical, revealing the characters' beliefs and motivations. It drives the scene forward and adds layers to the narrative.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, moral dilemmas, and emotional conflicts that drive the characters' decisions. The tension and urgency keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a gradual build-up of tension and emotional intensity leading to a climactic decision point. The rhythm of the dialogue and action keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' choices.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, following industry standards for screenplay format. The dialogue is well-paced and engaging, contributing to the overall effectiveness of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre by setting up the conflict, developing the characters' motivations, and building tension towards a decision point.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition between the underground facility and the greenhouse, causing a bit of confusion in the setting change.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Professor Brand feels a bit forced and expository, lacking a natural flow in the conversation.
  • The revelation about the Earth's atmosphere and the impending doom for Murph's generation feels heavy-handed and could be delivered in a more subtle manner.
  • The interaction between Cooper and Professor Brand regarding the mission to leave Earth lacks emotional depth and could benefit from more character development and conflict resolution.
  • The scene could use more visual descriptions to enhance the setting and create a more immersive experience for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition between the underground facility and the greenhouse to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Work on making the dialogue between Cooper and Professor Brand more natural and engaging, focusing on character dynamics and emotional depth.
  • Try to deliver the information about the Earth's atmosphere and the mission to leave Earth in a more subtle and nuanced way to avoid heavy-handed exposition.
  • Develop the emotional conflict and resolution between Cooper and Professor Brand to add depth to their interaction and make the scene more impactful.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions in the scene to create a vivid and immersive setting for the audience.



Scene 7 -  The Wormhole and the Lazarus Missions
INT. CONFERENCE ROOM - LATER
A man in his forties has the solar system up on the screen.
This is ROMILLY.
ROMILLY
We started detecting gravitational
anomalies almost fifty years ago.
Mostly small distortions to our
instruments in the upper atmosphere
- I believe you encountered one
yourself ...
32.


COOPER
(realizing)
Over the Straights - my crash -
something tripped my fly-by wire -

ROMILLY
Exactly. But the most significant
anomaly was this ...
Cooper stares at an image of Saturn and its moons. Romilly
zooms in on some stars DISTORTED like ripples in a pond.

ROMILLY
A disturbance of spacetime out near
Saturn.
COOPER
A wormhole?
ROMILLY
It appeared forty-eight years ago.
COOPER
Where does it lead?
PROFESSOR BRAND
Another galaxy.
COOPER
A wormhole isn’t a naturally
occurring phenomenon.
BRAND
Someone placed it there.

COOPER
’They’.
BRAND
And whoever ’They’ are, they appear
to be looking out for us - that
wormhole lets us travel to other
stars. It came along right as we
needed it.
DOYLE
They’ve put potentially habitable
worlds within our reach. Twelve, in
fact from our initial probes.
COOPER
You sent probes into it?
33.


PROFESSOR BRAND
We sent people into it. Ten years
ago.
COOPER
The Lazarus missions.
Professor Brand rises and moves to a MEMORIAL, pointing -
PROFESSOR BRAND
Twelve possible worlds. Twelve
Ranger launches carrying the
bravest humans ever to live, led by
the remarkable Dr Mann.
DOYLE
Each person’s landing pod had life
support for two years - but they
could use hibernation to stretch
that, making observations on
organics over a decade or more.
Their mission was to assess their
world, and if it showed promise,
send a signal, bed down for the
long nap, and wait to be rescued.
COOPER
And if their world didn’t show
promise?

DOYLE
Hence the bravery.
COOPER
Because you don’t have resources to
visit all twelve.
DOYLE
No. Data transmission back through
the wormhole is rudimentary, simple
binary ’pings’ on an annual basis
to give some clue as to which
worlds have potential. One system
shows promise.
COOPER
One? Kind of a long shot.
BRAND
One system with three potential
worlds ... no long shot.
34.


COOPER
So if we find a new home, what
then?
PROFESSOR BRAND
That’s the long shot. There’s Plan
A and there’s Plan B. Did you
notice anything strange about the
launch chamber ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary Romilly reveals the detection of gravitational anomalies, including a wormhole near Saturn created by an unknown entity. Professor Brand unveils the Lazarus missions, where humans were sent to explore potential new worlds, with one showing promise. They discuss Plan A (finding a habitable planet) and Plan B (evacuating Earth's population). Cooper realizes the anomaly influenced his failed fly-by wire during his crash.
Strengths
  • Intriguing concept of a wormhole near Saturn
  • High stakes and urgency established for the mission
  • Informative and engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development in the scene
  • Lack of interpersonal conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is crucial in setting up the main plot of the movie and introducing key elements of the story. It is filled with important information and creates a sense of mystery and urgency.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a wormhole near Saturn leading to potentially habitable worlds is innovative and sets the stage for the sci-fi adventure that follows. The idea of exploring new planets and the challenges involved in finding a new home for humanity are compelling.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene as the characters learn about the wormhole and the potential for interstellar travel. It introduces a new goal for the characters and raises the stakes for their mission.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on the concept of interstellar travel and human colonization, with a focus on the philosophical implications of exploring new worlds.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters in this scene serve mainly to convey information about the concept of the wormhole and the mission to find a new home. While they are not deeply developed in this particular scene, their reactions and interactions help drive the plot forward.

Character Changes: 5

There is no significant character development or change in this scene, as the focus is primarily on introducing the concept of the wormhole and the mission to find habitable worlds.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal is to understand the significance of the wormhole and the potential habitable worlds it leads to. This reflects his curiosity, sense of adventure, and desire to find a new home for humanity.

External Goal: 8

Cooper's external goal is to explore the potential habitable worlds through the wormhole and determine if they are suitable for human colonization. This reflects the immediate challenge of finding a new home for humanity.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 6

While there is no direct conflict between characters in this scene, the conflict arises from the high stakes involved in finding a new home for humanity and the challenges of interstellar travel.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints on the origins of the wormhole and the risks involved in exploring new worlds. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome of their mission.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high in this scene as the characters learn about the limited resources on Earth, the need to find a new home, and the challenges of interstellar travel. The fate of humanity hangs in the balance.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing the concept of the wormhole, the potential habitable worlds, and the mission to explore new planets. It sets up the main goal and conflict of the movie.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unknown origins of the wormhole, the potential dangers of exploring new worlds, and the moral dilemmas faced by the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of fate versus free will. Cooper questions whether the wormhole was placed there by a higher power, while Brand believes it was a deliberate act by an unknown entity.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of wonder, curiosity, and concern for the characters' mission. The revelation of the wormhole and the potential for new worlds adds emotional weight to the story.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in this scene is informative and engaging, providing key exposition about the wormhole, the Lazarus missions, and the potential habitable worlds. It effectively conveys the urgency and importance of the mission.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, intriguing scientific concepts, and philosophical discussions that keep the audience invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of exposition, dialogue, and tension-building moments that keep the audience engaged and eager to learn more.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a structured format for a sci-fi genre, with clear exposition, character interactions, and a buildup of tension.


Critique
  • The scene provides important exposition about gravitational anomalies and the discovery of a wormhole near Saturn, but it lacks emotional depth and character development.
  • The dialogue feels a bit expository and could benefit from more natural and engaging interactions between the characters.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the implications of the wormhole and the Lazarus missions on the characters' motivations and emotions.
  • The scene could be more visually engaging by incorporating elements that enhance the sense of wonder and mystery surrounding the wormhole and the potential habitable worlds.
  • The pacing of the scene could be improved by adding more tension or conflict to keep the audience engaged.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding personal stakes for the characters to make the exposition more relatable and emotionally resonant.
  • Enhance the dialogue by infusing it with more subtext, conflict, or character dynamics to make it more engaging.
  • Explore the characters' reactions to the information about the wormhole and the Lazarus missions to add depth and complexity to the scene.
  • Incorporate visual elements that enhance the sense of awe and mystery surrounding the discovery of the wormhole and the potential habitable worlds.
  • Consider adding a sense of urgency or conflict to the scene to maintain the audience's interest and drive the narrative forward.



Scene 8 -  The Launch Facility
INT. LAUNCH FACILITY - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper cocks his head, puzzling at the VAST chamber ...
there are structures built SIDEWAYS around the CURVED
walls...

COOPER
This whole facility ... it’s a
vehicle? A space station?
PROFESSOR BRAND
Both. We’ve been working on it, and
others like it for twenty-five
years. Plan A.
COOPER
How does it get off the Earth?

PROFESSOR BRAND
Those first gravitational anomalies
changed everything - suddenly we
knew that harnessing gravity was
real. So I started working on the
theory - and we start building this
station.
COOPER
But you haven’t solved it, yet.

PROFESSOR BRAND
That’s why there’s a Plan B.

INT. LABORATORY - MOMENTS LATER

TECHNICIANS work the complex, high-tech lab. Professor Brand
and Cooper follow Brand to a large glass and steel
apparatus.
BRAND
The problem is gravity. How to get
a viable amount of human life off
(MORE)
35.


BRAND (cont’d)
this planet. This is one way - Plan
B. A population bomb. Almost five
thousand fertilized eggs, weighing
in at under 900 kilos.
COOPER
How could you raise them?
BRAND
With equipment on board we incubate
the first ten. After that, with
surrogacy, the growth becomes
exponential - within thirty years
we might have a colony of hundreds.
The real difficulty of colonization
is genetic diversity,
(Indicates vials.)
This takes care of that.
Cooper looks at the equipment. Unenthusiastic.
COOPER
We just give up on the people here?

PROFESSOR BRAND
That’s why Plan A’s a lot more fun.

INT. PROFESSOR BRAND’S OFFICE

Professor Brand watches Cooper as he gazes over the vast
tracts of ALGEBRA covering every available surface.
COOPER
Where have you got to?

PROFESSOR BRAND
Almost there.
COOPER
Almost? You’re asking me to hang
everything on an ’almost’?
Professor Brand moves close to Cooper.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I’m asking you to trust me.

Cooper looks at the passion in Professor Brand’s eyes.
36.

COOPER
All those years of training - you
never told me.

PROFESSOR BRAND
We can’t always be open about
everything, Coop, even if we want
to be. What can you tell your
children about this mission?

Cooper considers this. Uneasy.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Find us a new home. When you
return, I’ll have solved the
problem of gravity. You have my
word.

EXT. FARMHOUSE - LATE DAY

Donald, on the porch, gets to his feet as he sees Cooper’s
pickup approaching. The truck pulls up. Murph TEARS past
Grandpa into the house - Donald looks at Cooper,
questioning.


INT. HALL OUTSIDE MURPH’S ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Cooper tries to open the door, but Murph has stacked a desk
and chair against it -
COOPER
Murph?
MURPH
Go! If you’re leaving, just go!


EXT. PORCH - NIGHT
Donald looks out at the night, taking it all in.
DONALD
This world never was enough for
you, was it, Coop?
COOPER
I’m not gonna lie to you, Donald -
heading out there is what I feel
born to do and it excites me. That
doesn’t make it wrong.
Donald considers this. Turns to Cooper.
37.


DONALD
It might. Don’t trust the right
thing done for the wrong reason.
The ’why’ of a thing? That’s the
foundation.

COOPER
(sadly)
Well, the foundation’s solid.
(Gestures at landscape.)
We farmers sit here every year when
the rains fail and say ’next year’.
Next year ain’t gonna save us. Nor
the one after. This world’s a
treasure, Donald. But she’s been
telling us to leave for a while
now.
(Stares at the horizon.)
Mankind was born on Earth. It was
never meant to die here.
Donald considers this. Scoops the dust off the rail.

DONALD
Tom’ll be okay. But you have to
make it right with Murph.
COOPER
I will.
DONALD
Without making any promises you
don’t know you can keep.

Cooper meets Donald’s gaze. Looks away, nodding.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper is taken to a launch facility where he is shown a massive structure that is both a vehicle and a space station. Professor Brand explains that they have been working on it for 25 years as Plan A to solve the problem of gravity and get humans off Earth. However, they haven't solved it yet, which is why there is a Plan B: a population bomb of fertilized eggs that can be incubated and raised on board the station to create a new colony. Cooper is unenthusiastic about Plan B, as it involves giving up on the people on Earth. Professor Brand assures him that Plan A is still their goal, but they need to trust her to find a solution. Cooper struggles with the decision, but ultimately agrees to go on the mission. He returns home to find his daughter Murph has barricaded herself in her room and refuses to see him.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Complex themes
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more concise

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is well-written, with strong emotional depth and thought-provoking themes. It effectively sets up the central conflict of the story and showcases the internal struggle of the protagonist.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of leaving Earth to find a new home for humanity is compelling and thought-provoking. The ethical implications of such a decision are explored in depth, adding layers to the narrative.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene, as the protagonist is faced with a crucial decision that will shape the rest of the story. The conflict is heightened, and the stakes are raised.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the sci-fi genre by focusing on the human element of space exploration. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and grounded in reality.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters are well-developed, with complex motivations and emotions. Their interactions reveal their inner struggles and dilemmas, adding depth to the narrative.

Character Changes: 8

The protagonist undergoes significant internal change in this scene, as he wrestles with his personal desires and the greater good. This sets up a potential character arc for future development.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to reconcile his desire to explore space with his responsibilities to his family, particularly his daughter Murph. He struggles with the idea of leaving Earth and the people he loves behind.

External Goal: 7.5

Cooper's external goal is to help Professor Brand with the mission to find a new home for humanity and solve the problem of gravity. He is also faced with the decision of whether to leave Earth and embark on this mission.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is high, both internally within the protagonist and externally in the decision to leave Earth. The emotional conflict adds depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting desires and moral dilemmas creating tension and uncertainty for the characters.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes in the scene are high, as the characters are faced with the decision to leave Earth and potentially sacrifice everything they know for the survival of humanity. The personal and ethical stakes are raised, adding tension to the narrative.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, introducing key plot points and setting up the central conflict of the narrative. It propels the characters towards a crucial decision that will shape the rest of the story.

Unpredictability: 7.5

This scene is unpredictable because it presents conflicting desires and moral dilemmas for the characters, leaving the audience unsure of the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of sacrifice for the greater good. Cooper must weigh his personal desires against the needs of humanity and the future of the planet.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, as the characters grapple with difficult decisions and the potential consequences of their actions. The audience is likely to feel a sense of empathy and connection with the characters.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is impactful and serves to convey the characters' emotions and conflicting viewpoints effectively. It drives the scene forward and adds tension.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it presents a high-stakes decision for the protagonist, balancing personal and global concerns. The emotional depth and moral dilemmas keep the audience invested.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and emotional depth, allowing the audience to connect with the characters and their dilemmas.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi drama, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and dialogue flow smoothly, engaging the audience.


Critique
  • The scene provides important exposition about Plan A and Plan B, but the dialogue feels a bit heavy-handed and expository at times.
  • The transition between different locations and conversations could be smoother to enhance the flow of the scene.
  • The emotional depth of the characters could be further explored to create a more impactful and engaging interaction between Cooper and Professor Brand.
  • The visual elements described in the scene could be more vividly depicted to immerse the audience in the setting and enhance the overall atmosphere.
  • The conflict between Cooper's desire to explore space and his responsibility to his family could be further emphasized to add depth to his character.
Suggestions
  • Consider incorporating more subtle ways to convey the information about Plan A and Plan B to avoid overly expositional dialogue.
  • Work on refining the transitions between different locations to create a seamless narrative flow.
  • Focus on developing the emotional dynamics between Cooper and Professor Brand to add depth and authenticity to their interaction.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more immersive and visually engaging scene for the audience.
  • Explore the internal conflict within Cooper more explicitly to highlight the emotional stakes and complexities of his decision to leave for the mission.



Scene 9 -  Emotional Farewell
INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - MORNING
Cooper’s hand, reaching in, removes the chair from the desk,
barricading the door. Murph is lying on the bed, turned
away. Cooper pushes the desk back gently. Enters, quietly.
COOPER
You have to talk to me.

Nothing.
I have to fix this before I go.
Murph turns, tear-stained, angry cheeks blazing -
38.

MURPH
Then I’ll keep it broken so you
have to stay.

Cooper sits down on the bed next to Murph.
COOPER
After you kids came along, your
mother said something I didn’t
really understand - she said, ’I
look at the babies and I see myself
as they’ll remember me.’ She said,
’It’s as if we don’t exist anymore,
like we’re ghosts, like now we’re
just there to be memories for our
kids.’ Now I realize - once we’re
parents, we’re just the ghosts of
our childrens’ futures.
MURPH
You said ghosts don’t exist.

COOPER
That’s right. I can’t be your ghost
right now - I need to exist.
Because they chose me. They chose
me, Murph. You saw it. Murph sits
up.
Points at the shelves. The gaps.
MURPH
I figured out the message ...
(Opens her notebook.)
It was Morse code ...
COOPER
Murph -

MURPH
One word. You know what it is?
Cooper shakes his head sadly. Murph holds out her notebook -
’STAY’. It says ’STAY’, Dad.

COOPER
Oh, Murph.
MURPH
You don’t believe me?! Look the
books! Look at -
Cooper takes his daughter in his arms ...
39.

COOPER
It’s okay, it’s okay ...

Murph buries her head on Cooper’s shoulder, sobbing.
Murph, a father looks in his
child’s eyes and thinks - maybe
it’s them ... maybe my child will
save the world. And everyone, once
a child, wants to look into their
own dad’s eyes and know he saw how
they saved some little corner of
their world. But, usually, by then,
the father is gone.
MURPH
Like you will be.
Cooper looks at his daughter. Lies with head, not heart:
COOPER
No. I’m coming back.

MURPH
When?
Cooper reaches into his pocket. Pulls out two WATCHES.

COOPER
One for you. One for me.
Murph takes the watch, curious. Cooper holds up his watch.
When I’m in hyper-sleep, or travel
near the speed of light, or near a
black hole, time will change for
me. It’ll run more slowly. When I
get back we’ll compare.
MURPH
Time will run differently for us?
COOPER
Yup. By the time I get back we
might even be the same age. You and
me. Imagine that ...

Murph takes this in. Cooper sees he’s made a mistake.
Wait, Murph -
MURPH
You have no idea when you’re coming
back.
Cooper looks at his daughter.
40.


MURPH
No idea at all!
Murph THROWS the watch - TURNS HER BACK.
COOPER
Don’t make me leave like this.
Nothing.
Please. I have to go now.

Murph will not turn around. Cooper tries to rest his hand on
the back of her head, but she shakes it off.
COOPER
I love you, Murph. Forever. And I’m
coming back.

Cooper walks slowly out. A BOOK DROPS FROM THE SHELF. Cooper
turns to look at it. Then leaves.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary In Murph's barricaded bedroom, Cooper attempts to reconcile before leaving. Murph, angry and upset, reveals she decoded the bookshelf message as 'STAY'. Despite Cooper's denial, she confronts him with the missing books. He fabricates a return promise and offers a watch to measure time dilation. Murph, realizing Cooper's uncertainty, throws it at him. Heartbroken, Cooper departs as a book falls from the shelf.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Strong character development
  • Poignant dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some cliched dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally powerful, with strong character development and thematic depth. The dialogue is poignant and thought-provoking, and the conflict between the characters is palpable.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of time dilation and the emotional impact of leaving loved ones behind are central to the scene. The idea of sacrificing personal relationships for the greater good is explored effectively.

Plot: 8

The plot advances as the father prepares to leave on a mission to save humanity, setting up future conflicts and resolutions. The emotional stakes are high, driving the narrative forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the theme of parental sacrifice and the concept of time dilation, blending personal drama with sci-fi elements in a unique and engaging way. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with complex emotions and motivations. The father's internal struggle and the daughter's defiance and vulnerability create a compelling dynamic.

Character Changes: 8

Both characters undergo emotional changes in the scene, with the father coming to terms with his decision to leave and the daughter grappling with her father's departure. Their relationship evolves as they confront their feelings.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to mend his relationship with his daughter, Murph, before he leaves on a dangerous mission. This reflects his deeper need for connection, his fear of being forgotten or replaced, and his desire to be a positive influence in his children's lives.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to explain the concept of time dilation to his daughter and reassure her that he will come back. This reflects the immediate challenge of convincing Murph to understand and accept his departure.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the father and daughter is intense and emotional, driving the emotional core of the scene. The internal conflict within the father adds depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Murph's resistance to her father's departure creating a compelling conflict that drives the emotional intensity of the scene. The audience is left uncertain of how the conflict will be resolved.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the father prepares to leave on a mission to save humanity, risking his life and sacrificing his personal relationships. The emotional stakes are particularly intense, adding depth to the scene.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by establishing the emotional stakes for the characters and setting up future conflicts and resolutions. The decision to leave on the mission propels the narrative forward.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the emotional twists and turns in the characters' interactions, the unexpected revelations about the message in the books, and the uncertainty of the protagonist's return. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the scene will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the tension between parental duty and personal ambition. Cooper grapples with the idea of being a ghost in his children's lives while also pursuing his own dreams of exploration and discovery.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotional, evoking feelings of sadness, longing, and hope. The father-daughter relationship is at the heart of the emotional impact, resonating with the audience.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is heartfelt and authentic, revealing the characters' inner thoughts and feelings. The use of Morse code and scientific concepts adds depth to the conversation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional intensity of the interactions between the characters, the high stakes of the protagonist's departure, and the thematic depth of the dialogue. The audience is drawn into the personal struggles and conflicts of the characters.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a gradual build-up of tension and emotion leading to a climactic moment of revelation and conflict. The rhythm of the dialogue and character interactions enhances the effectiveness of the scene.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions and character actions are effectively conveyed through the formatting.

Structure: 9

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in conveying the emotional depth of the characters' interactions.


Critique
  • The scene is emotionally charged and effectively conveys the strained relationship between Cooper and Murph.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Murph is poignant and reveals the underlying tension and emotions of the characters.
  • The use of the watch as a symbol of time dilation and the uncertainty of Cooper's return adds depth to the scene.
  • The revelation of the Morse code message 'STAY' adds a layer of complexity to their relationship and highlights Murph's desperation for her father to stay.
  • The scene effectively explores themes of sacrifice, family, and the passage of time.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual elements to enhance the emotional impact of the scene, such as close-up shots of the characters' expressions or symbolic objects.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating flashbacks or memories to further develop the backstory of Cooper and Murph's relationship.
  • Provide more context or backstory on why Cooper feels compelled to leave and the urgency of the mission to save humanity.
  • Consider adding moments of reconciliation or resolution between Cooper and Murph to provide a sense of closure to their conflict.
  • Experiment with different pacing or structure to build tension and suspense throughout the scene.



Scene 10 -  Departure
EXT. FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER

Cooper, mechanical, puts his small bag in the truck.
DONALD
How’d it go?

COOPER
Fine. It was fine.
Cooper turns to Tom. Hugs him. Tight enough for both kids.
I love you, Tom.

TOM
Travel safe, Dad.
COOPER
(indicates farm)
Look after our place, you hear?

TOM
Can I use your truck while you’re
gone?

COOPER
(smiles)
I’ll make sure they bring it back
for you.
Cooper gets in. Starts the engine.
Mind my kids for me, Donald.
41.


Donald nods. Cooper pulls out.

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
Murph jumps off the bed, GRABS the watch, RUNS downstairs.


INT. PICKUP TRUCK - CONTINUOUS
As Cooper drives he lifts the blanket in the wheel-well
where Murph hid last time. Nothing. And we hear a
COUNTDOWN...
VOICE
(O.S.)
TEN ... NINE ...


EXT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
Murph RACES out of the house, watch in hand -

MURPH
Dad?! DAD?!
VOICE
(V.O.)
EIGHT ... SEVEN ...

But Cooper is a dust trail far down the road.
VOICE
(O.S.)
SIX ... FIVE ...

Murph SOBS as her grandpa puts his arms around her ...

INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DUSTY PLAIN - CONTINUOUS

As Cooper drives away tears roll down his cheeks
VOICE
(O.S.)
FOUR ... THREE ... TWO ... ONE ...
42.


INT. LAUNCH FACILITY - DAY
VOICE
(O.S.)
IGNITION.

FIRE SHOOTS FROM THE BASE OF THE ROCKET ... The rocket RISES
slowly from the pad, up into the sky ...

INT. RANGER COCKPIT - CONTINUOUS

Cooper, in his space helmet, lets the FORCE of the rocket
vibrate through him ...
VOICE
(O.S.)
Stage one ... SEPARATION.
Cooper starts to see the Earth’s curve through the window...
VOICE
(O.S.)
Stage two ... SEPARATION.
And Cooper shakes loose the bonds of Earth.

EXT. UPPER ATMOSPHERE - CONTINUOUS

The rocket RIPS upwards into the sky.
INT. RANGER COCKPIT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper glances around the vibrating, cramped cockpit -
Brand, Doyle, Romilly, Tars. Tars spots Cooper’s glance -
TARS
All here, Mr Cooper. Plenty of
slaves for my robot colony.

Cooper looks at him, confused.
DOYLE
They gave him a humor setting so
he’d fit in with his unit better.
He thinks it relaxes us.
COOPER
A massive, sarcastic robot. What a
great idea.
43.


TARS
I have a cue light I can turn on
when I’m joking, if you like.
COOPER
Probably help.
TARS
You can use it to find your way
back to the ship after I blow you
out the airlock.

Tars looks at Cooper. A beat. An LED turns on. Cooper shakes
his head.
COOPER
What’s your humor setting, Tars?

TARS
One hundred percent.
Cooper turns to the instruments -

COOPER
Take it to seventy-five, please.

EARTH ORBIT - CONTINUOUS

The Rangers streak across the Earth, settle into a low
orbit.

INT. RANGER COCKPIT - CONTINUOUS

Quiet. Cooper stares down at the continents sliding by. He
looks over at Brand who is doing the same, abstracted.
COOPER
We’ll get back.

She stares at the land. The oceans.
It’s hard. Leaving everything. My
kids ... your father ...
BRAND
We’re going to spend a lot of time
together ...
COOPER
(nods)
We should learn to talk.
44.


BRAND
And when not to.
(Off look.)
Just trying to be honest.

COOPER
Maybe you don’t need to be that
honest.
(Turns to Tars.)
Tars, what’s your honesty
parameter?

Tars DISENGAGES from the floor and MOVES to the rear airlock
-
TARS
Ninety percent.

COOPER
Ninety? What kind of robot are you?
TARS
Absolute honesty isn’t always the
most diplomatic, or safe form of
communication with emotional
beings.
Cooper turns to Brand. Shrugs.

COOPER
Ninety percent honesty it is, then.
Brand looks at Cooper. Can’t help smiling.

VOICE
(over radio)
Sixty seconds out...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper bids farewell to his son, overwhelmed with emotion as he drives away. Despite Murph's desperate attempt to catch up, Cooper leaves. As the rocket launches, carrying Cooper, Brand, Doyle, Romilly, and Tars, their journey to space commences.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • High stakes
  • Intriguing concept
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys the emotional turmoil of leaving loved ones behind while embarking on a dangerous mission. It sets up the central conflict and stakes of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of leaving Earth to find a new habitable world, the introduction of Plan A and Plan B for survival, and the exploration of gravitational anomalies add depth and intrigue to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly as Cooper agrees to pilot the Endurance and leaves Earth, setting the stage for the main journey of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on the theme of family sacrifice for exploration, with a unique blend of rural and space elements. The characters' interactions feel authentic and relatable.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters show emotional depth and conflict, especially Cooper and Murph, as they struggle with the decision to part ways. The introduction of Tars adds a touch of humor and intrigue.

Character Changes: 8

Cooper undergoes a significant change as he decides to pilot the Endurance and leave Earth, setting him on a new path. Murph also experiences emotional growth as she confronts her father.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to reconcile his duty to his family with his desire to explore space. He struggles with leaving his children behind while pursuing his passion for discovery.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to successfully launch the rocket and complete the space mission. This reflects the immediate challenge he faces in achieving his dream of exploring the universe.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The internal conflict of leaving loved ones behind and the external conflict of the mission to find a new home for humanity create a tense atmosphere.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with emotional and logistical obstacles that challenge the characters' goals and relationships, adding depth to the narrative.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of leaving Earth, the survival of humanity, and the unknown challenges ahead create a sense of urgency and importance in the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by setting up the main mission of finding a new home for humanity and establishing the central conflict and stakes.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in moments of tension and emotional conflict, keeping the audience on edge about the characters' fates and decisions.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the balance between honesty and diplomacy in communication. Tars represents the idea that absolute honesty may not always be the best approach when dealing with emotional beings.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions of sadness, hope, and resignation as characters grapple with difficult decisions and farewells.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the characters' emotions and inner conflicts, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its emotional depth, suspenseful moments, and character dynamics that keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional depth, creating a sense of anticipation and urgency as the characters face their challenges.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a screenplay, with clear scene headings and dialogue formatting that enhances readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure that effectively transitions between different locations and character interactions, maintaining a cohesive narrative flow.


Critique
  • The scene lacks emotional depth and impact considering the significant moment of Cooper leaving his family to embark on a space mission.
  • The dialogue between Cooper, Tom, and Donald feels rushed and lacks the emotional weight needed to convey the gravity of the situation.
  • The countdown sequence and Murph's reaction to Cooper leaving could be more impactful and emotionally resonant.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional turmoil and conflict within Cooper as he says goodbye to his family and heads off into space.
  • The humor injected through Tars' dialogue feels out of place and disrupts the serious tone of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Add more emotional depth to the interactions between Cooper, Tom, and Donald to convey the weight of Cooper's decision to leave.
  • Enhance the countdown sequence and Murph's reaction to create a more impactful and emotional moment.
  • Explore Cooper's internal conflict and emotional struggle more explicitly to engage the audience with his decision to leave.
  • Consider toning down the humor from Tars to maintain the serious and emotional tone of the scene.
  • Focus on the emotional journey of the characters to create a more resonant and compelling farewell scene.



Scene 11 -  Voyage to Saturn
EXT. EARTH ORBIT - CONTINUOUS

The Rangers approach a RING MODULE, fire retro-thrusters and
slide gracefully into the center of the ring - the last
piece of a large modular craft: the U.S.S. ENDURANCE. Four
LANDERS (including the Rangers) are nestled inside the ring
module.
45.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - MOMENTS LATER
Brand, Doyle and Romilly, following Tars, FLOAT through the
cramped cabins, powering up. Tars powers up a second
articulated machine, CASE.

DOYLE
Cooper, you should have control.

INT. COCKPIT, ENDURANCE (RANGER) - CONTINUOUS

Cooper checks instruments -
COOPER
Talking fine. Ready to spin?


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Doyle and Romilly are strapped in - Brand grabs a handhold -


INT. COCKPIT, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
BRAND
(over radio)
All set.

Cooper hits a switch ...

EXT. EARTH ORBIT - CONTINUOUS
Thrusters silently fire on the Endurance. It starts
ROTATING.

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The crew members settle in as gravity is established.
Romilly is clearly struggling to find his sea legs in the
rotating ship.
BRAND
You okay there?

ROMILLY
Yup. Just need a little time -
BRAND
There should be Dramamine in the
hab pod.
46.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - LATER
The crew listen to Professor Brand over the video link -
PROFESSOR BRAND
(on screen)
I miss you already. Amelia, be
safe. Give my regards to Dr Mann.
BRAND
I will, Dad.

PROFESSOR BRAND
(on screen)
Things look good for your
trajectory. We’re calculating two
years to Saturn.

ROMILLY
That’s a lot of Dramamine ...
Cooper thinks about two years. What it means to his kids.

COOPER
(on screen)
Keep an eye on my family, sir.
Specially Murph. She’s a smart one.
PROFESSOR BRAND
(on screen)
We’ll be waiting when you get back
...


INT. COCKPIT, ENDURANCE - LATER
Cooper and Doyle flick switches and check instruments -
PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
... A little older. A little wiser.
But happy to see you ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Brand, Romilly, Tars and Case strap in.
PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
’Do not go gentle into that good
night ...’
47.

INT. COCKPIT, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Cooper turns to Doyle. HITS the thrusters.


EXT. EARTH ORBIT - CONTINUOUS
Endurance’s main engines FIRE. The craft PUSHES out of orbit
-

PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
’Rage, rage against the dying of
the light.’ God speed, Endurance.

The craft accelerates away from Earth.

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - DAY
The crew sets up their CRYO-BEDS. Cooper looks out at the
diminishing Earth floating in the void. Brand joins him.
COOPER
So alone.
BRAND
We’ve got each other - Dr Mann had
it worse.
COOPER
(points at Earth)
I meant them. Look at that perfect
planet. We’re not gonna find
another one like her.
BRAND
No. This isn’t like looking for a
new condo - the human race is going
to be adrift ... desperate for a
rock to cling to while they catch
their breaths. We have to find that
rock. Our three prospects are at
the edge of what might sustain
human life.
Brand shows him a blurry image of a dark blue planet.
Laura Miller’s first. She started
our biology program.

She shows him a red world, just a tiny dot.
And Wolf Edmunds is here.
Cooper hears something in her voice.
48.


COOPER
Who’s Edmunds?
BRAND
(fondly)
Wolf’s a particle physicist.

COOPER
None of them had family?
BRAND
No attachments. My father insisted.
They knew the odds against ever
seeing another human being. I’m
hoping we surprise at least three
of them.

COOPER
Tell me about Dr Mann.
Brand replaces the screen image for a grainy, white orb.
BRAND
Remarkable. The best of us. My
father’s protégé. He inspired
eleven people to follow him on the
loneliest journey in human history.
Scientists, explorers ... That’s
what I love - out there we face
great odds. Death. But not evil.
COOPER
Nature can’t be evil?
BRAND
Formidable, frightening - not evil.
Is a tiger evil because it rips a
gazelle to pieces?
COOPER
Just what we bring with us, then.
BRAND
This crew represents the best
aspects of humanity.

COOPER
Even me?
Brand looks at him. Smiles.
49.


BRAND
Hey, we agreed, ninety percent.
Brand moves to her cryo-bed. Cooper looks out at space.
BRAND
Don’t stay up too late. We can’t
spare the resources.
COOPER
Hey, I’ve been waiting a long time
to be up here -
BRAND
You are literally wasting your
breath.

Cooper nods at her. Joins Tars.
COOPER
Show me the trajectory again.
TARS
Eight months to Mars, then
counter-orbital slingshot around -
Brand’s cryo-bed darkens.
COOPER
(whisper)
Tars? Was Dr Brand -
TARS
Why are you whispering? You can’t
wake them.

COOPER
Were Dr Brand and Edmunds ...
close?

TARS
I wouldn’t know.
COOPER
Is that ninety percent, or ten
percent ’wouldn’t know’?

TARS
I also have a discretion setting.
COOPER
So I gather ...
(Rises.)
(MORE)
50.


COOPER (cont’d)
But not a poker face.
Tars watches Cooper head for the comm. station. He sits down
to record a message. Awkward. Stuck. He dives in -
Hey, guys. I’m about settle down
for the long nap, so I figured I’d
send you an update ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary The Endurance embarks on its journey to Saturn with Cooper, Brand, Doyle, and Romilly settling into cryo-beds for the two-year voyage. Brand highlights the three potential planets, discovered by previous astronauts. Cooper inquires about Dr. Mann, a renowned astronaut on the third planet, drawing admiration from Brand. Despite curiosity about Brand's connection to Edmunds, Tars remains silent. Cooper records a message for his family before entering cryo-sleep.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth of characters
  • Exploration of ethical dilemmas
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue
  • Lack of external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is well-written, engaging, and sets up important elements for the rest of the story. It is emotionally impactful and thought-provoking.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of humanity searching for a new home in space, the ethical implications of leaving Earth behind, and the personal sacrifices made for the greater good are compelling and well-developed.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene as the characters embark on their journey to find a new habitable planet. It sets up the main conflict and goals of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh perspective on space exploration, focusing on the emotional and philosophical challenges faced by astronauts. The dialogue feels authentic and the characters' actions reflect their internal struggles.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are complex, with internal conflicts and motivations that drive their actions. Their relationships and personal struggles add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo some changes, particularly in their acceptance of the mission and the sacrifices they have to make. Their relationships and perspectives shift.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to come to terms with leaving his family behind for a two-year mission. He grapples with the idea of missing out on his children growing up and the impact it will have on them.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully navigate the spacecraft and carry out the mission to Saturn. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of space travel and exploration.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

There is a moderate level of conflict in the scene, mainly internal conflicts and ethical dilemmas faced by the characters.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is not overtly strong, but there are subtle conflicts and challenges that add depth to the characters' journeys.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters are tasked with finding a new habitable planet for humanity's survival. The future of the human race is at risk.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly by setting up the main goal of finding a new home for humanity and the challenges they will face on their journey.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is somewhat predictable in terms of its narrative progression, but the emotional and philosophical elements add layers of complexity.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the nature of humanity and the challenges of space exploration. Brand and Cooper discuss the concept of evil and the best aspects of humanity in the face of great odds.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene is emotionally impactful, especially in the interactions between the characters and the weight of their decisions. It evokes a sense of nostalgia and hope for the future.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is meaningful and reveals important information about the characters and their motivations. It also sets the tone for the scene and the overall story.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, philosophical discussions, and the sense of anticipation for the upcoming mission.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is well-balanced, allowing for moments of reflection and action to coexist effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with distinct transitions between locations and characters.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi genre, with a focus on character interactions and setting up the mission's objectives.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency or tension, considering the gravity of the situation and the mission at hand.
  • The dialogue feels a bit expository and lacks emotional depth, especially given the circumstances of leaving Earth and embarking on a dangerous mission.
  • The interactions between the characters, especially Cooper and Brand, could be more nuanced and reflective of the weight of their decisions.
  • The transition between the different settings and characters could be smoother to enhance the flow of the scene.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional impact of leaving Earth and the uncertainty of the mission.
Suggestions
  • Add more emotional depth to the dialogue and interactions between the characters to convey the gravity of the situation.
  • Create a sense of urgency and tension by highlighting the risks and challenges of the mission.
  • Consider adding internal monologues or reflections from the characters to provide insight into their thoughts and emotions.
  • Enhance the transitions between settings and characters to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Explore the themes of sacrifice, hope, and the unknown future more explicitly to engage the audience on a deeper level.



Scene 12 -  Contact with Earth
EXT. OUTER SPACE - CONTINUOUS

The Endurance slips away from the small blue planet ...
COOPER
(V.O.)
The Earth looks amazing from here
... you can’t see any of the dust -

EXT. CORNFIELDS - DAY
A line of dust slides across the shimmering horizon.

COOPER
(V.O.)
Hope you guys are doing great. This
should get to you okay ...


EXT. FRONT PORCH, FARMHOUSE - DAY
Donald watches two approaching vehicles kick up dust.
COOPER
(V.O.)
Professor Brand said he’d make sure
of it. Guess I’ll say good night.
Donald recognizes Cooper’s truck ... Murph BURSTS out of the
house -

MURPH
(quiet)
Is it him?

DONALD
I don’t think so, Murph.
Donald rises to meet the truck. Professor Brand gets out.
51.


PROFESSOR BRAND
You must be Donald. Hello, Murph.
MURPH
Why’re you in my dad’s truck?

PROFESSOR BRAND
He wanted me to bring it for your
brother.
Silence. Professor Brand reaches into his briefcase.
He sent you a message -
Murph TURNS and goes back into the house. Donald takes a
disc from Professor Brand.
DONALD
Pretty upset with him for leaving.
PROFESSOR BRAND
If you record messages, I’ll
transmit them to Cooper.

Donald nods. Professor Brand looks up at the house.
Murph’s a bright spark. Maybe I
could fan the flame.
DONALD
She’s already making fools of her
teachers. She should come make a
fool out of you.
Professor Brand smiles. Donald looks up into the blue.
Where are they?

PROFESSOR BRAND
Heading towards Mars ...

EXT. MARS - DAY

The Endurance streaks away from Mars ...
PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
Next time we hear from Cooper,
they’ll be coming up on Saturn.
52.


EXT. SATURN - DAY
The Endurance settles into an orbit around the ringed giant.
TOM
(O.S.)
But they said I can start advanced
agriculture a year early ...

INT. COMMUNICATIONS BOOTH, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Cooper, blanket around his shoulders, watches a highly
compressed video of Tom -
TOM
Got to go, Dad. Hope you’re safe up
there.
Tom makes way for Donald:
DONALD
I’m sorry, Coop, I asked Murph to
say hi, but she’s stubborn as her
old man. I’ll try again next time,
stay safe.
The video cuts out. Cooper gets up, puts a pair of EAR BUDS
in his ears and heads into -


OMITTED

INT. HAB POD, RING MODULE - LATER

Cooper enters. Romilly is staring out the window.
COOPER
You good, Rom?

Romilly looks at Cooper.
ROMILLY
It gets to me, Coop. This tin can.
Radiation, vacuum outside -
everything wants us dead. We’re
just not supposed to be here.
Cooper looks at him, sympathetic.
53.


COOPER
We’re explorers, Rom, on the
greatest ocean of all.
Romilly bangs on the side of the ship.

ROMILLY
Millimeters of aluminium. That’s
it. And nothing within millions of
miles that won’t kill us in
seconds.

COOPER
A lot of the finest solo yachtsmen
couldn’t swim. They knew if they
went overboard that was it, anyway.
This is no different.

Romilly considers this. Cooper passes him his ear buds -
COOPER
Here -

And the sounds of a THUNDERSTORM wash over Romilly, sounds
that take us to ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper sends a message to his family on Earth from space. He expresses his awe at the view of Earth from space and hopes that his family is doing well. Donald watches two vehicles approach, but it is not Cooper. Professor Brand arrives in Cooper's truck and gives Donald a message from Cooper. Murph is upset with Cooper for leaving. Professor Brand offers to transmit messages from Donald to Cooper. Donald agrees. Professor Brand suggests that Murph is a bright spark and should come to work with him. Donald looks up into the sky and asks where Cooper is. Professor Brand says that Cooper is heading towards Mars. The Endurance streaks away from Mars. Cooper watches a video message from his son, Tom. Tom says that he is doing well and that he hopes Cooper is safe. Donald apologizes to Cooper for not getting Murph to say hi. Cooper enters the Hab Pod and talks to Romilly about the dangers of space travel. Romilly expresses his fear of being in space, but Cooper reassures him that they are explorers and that they are meant to be there. Cooper gives Romilly his earbuds and the sounds of a thunderstorm wash over Romilly.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Compelling concept
  • Poignant dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some pacing issues
  • Lack of action

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively blends the emotional weight of leaving loved ones behind with the excitement and uncertainty of embarking on a space mission. The dialogue and character interactions are poignant and thought-provoking.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of leaving Earth to search for a new habitable planet is a compelling and high-stakes premise that drives the narrative forward. The scene effectively introduces the audience to the challenges and sacrifices involved in such a mission.

Plot: 7

The plot advances as the characters prepare to leave Earth and head towards Saturn, setting the stage for the main mission of finding a new home for humanity. The scene effectively sets up the conflict and emotional stakes of the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on space exploration by focusing on the emotional and personal aspects of the characters, adding depth and authenticity to their actions and dialogue.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, particularly Cooper and Murph, are well-developed and their emotional struggles add depth to the scene. The interactions between the characters reveal their inner conflicts and motivations.

Character Changes: 8

The characters, especially Cooper and Murph, undergo significant emotional changes in the scene as they come to terms with the decision to leave Earth. Their relationships and perspectives shift, setting the stage for future character development.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to maintain a connection with his family while on the mission, as seen through his messages and interactions with his daughter and father. This reflects his desire for connection and belonging despite the distance.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully complete the mission and transmit messages back to Earth. This goal is driven by the immediate challenges and responsibilities of the mission.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, as the characters struggle with their emotions and the decision to leave Earth. The high stakes of the mission add tension and uncertainty to the narrative.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create conflict and uncertainty, driving the characters' actions and decisions.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene as the characters prepare to leave Earth behind and embark on a dangerous mission to find a new home for humanity. The emotional and physical risks involved add tension and urgency to the narrative.

Story Forward: 8

The scene effectively moves the story forward by setting up the main mission to find a new habitable planet. The decisions and actions of the characters propel the narrative towards the next phase of the story.

Unpredictability: 7

The scene is unpredictable in its emotional twists and character interactions, adding depth and complexity to the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the sacrifices and risks of exploration versus the desire for connection and family. This challenges the protagonist's beliefs about duty and personal relationships.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, as the characters grapple with the consequences of leaving their loved ones behind. The poignant moments and heartfelt dialogue resonate with the audience and evoke a sense of empathy.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and reflective, capturing the emotional turmoil of the characters as they grapple with the decision to leave Earth. The conversations between the characters reveal their relationships and inner thoughts.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of emotional moments and technical details, keeping the audience invested in the characters' journeys.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene enhances its effectiveness by balancing emotional moments with technical exposition, maintaining a sense of tension and intrigue.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a sci-fi screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure that transitions between different locations and characters, maintaining a cohesive narrative flow.


Critique
  • The scene transitions abruptly from outer space to cornfields to the front porch of the farmhouse, which can be disorienting for the audience.
  • The dialogue between Donald and Professor Brand feels a bit forced and lacks depth, making it less engaging for the audience.
  • Murph's reaction to seeing Professor Brand in her dad's truck is not clearly conveyed, leaving the audience wondering about her emotions.
  • The interaction between Donald and Professor Brand about Murph's potential is interesting but could be more impactful with deeper dialogue and character development.
  • The scene lacks a clear emotional arc for Cooper, Murph, and Donald, making it challenging for the audience to connect with the characters.
  • The transition from Mars to Saturn is abrupt and could benefit from a smoother transition to help the audience follow the story more easily.
  • The dialogue between Tom and Cooper lacks emotional depth and could be more impactful to convey the emotional weight of their separation.
  • The scene with Romilly expressing his fears and Cooper trying to reassure him feels a bit cliched and could be more nuanced to add depth to their characters.
  • The sounds of a thunderstorm washing over Romilly at the end of the scene feels disconnected from the rest of the dialogue and action, making the scene end on an awkward note.
Suggestions
  • Consider refining the transitions between different locations to create a smoother flow in the scene.
  • Enhance the dialogue between characters to add depth, emotion, and authenticity to their interactions.
  • Focus on conveying the emotional journey of the characters more clearly to engage the audience and create a stronger connection.
  • Work on developing the characters of Murph, Donald, and Professor Brand to make their interactions more compelling and meaningful.
  • Ensure that the scene transitions are seamless and logical to help the audience follow the story effectively.
  • Revise the dialogue between Tom and Cooper to make it more emotionally resonant and impactful for the audience.
  • Explore ways to make the interaction between Romilly and Cooper more nuanced and realistic to enhance the authenticity of their relationship.
  • Consider ending the scene on a more impactful and cohesive note that ties together the various elements of the dialogue and action.



Scene 13 -  Approaching the Wormhole
EXT. SPACE - CONTINUOUS

The Endurance is a tiny speck before the ringed gassy giant.

INT. NAVIGATION, RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks over Doyle’s shoulder - he’s flicking through
images of star fields, distorted as if through a fish-eye
lens.
COOPER
From the relay probe?

DOYLE
It was in orbit around the wormhole
- each time it swung around we got
images of the other side of the
foreign galaxy.

COOPER
Like swinging a periscope around?
DOYLE
Exactly.
54.

COOPER
So we’ve got a pretty good idea
what we’re gonna find on the other
side?
DOYLE
Navigationally.
Brand approaches.

BRAND
We’ll be coming up on the wormhole
in less than forty-five. Suit up.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - LATER
Cooper straps in, peering out at the inky blackness past
Saturn. Romilly joins him there, excited.
COOPER
(over radio)
Strap in - I’m killing the spin ...

EXT. SATURN - CONTINUOUS

As the Endurance streaks past Saturn, it stops rotating,
headed for a DISTORTED BLUR of stars.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

ROMILLY
There!
He points at the SPHERICAL blur of stars.

ROMILLY
That’s it! That’s the wormhole!
COOPER
Say it, don’t spray it, Rom.

ROMILLY
Cooper, this is a portal, cutting
through spacetime -
(Points.)
We’re seeing into the heart of a
galaxy so far away we don’t even
know where it is in the universe.
Cooper stares at the wormhole as they approach: a massive
spherical lens into another galaxy.
55.


COOPER
It’s a sphere.
ROMILLY
Of course it is. You thought it
would be just a hole?

COOPER
No ... well, in all the
illustrations -

Romilly grabs a piece of paper, draws two points, far apart
-
ROMILLY
In the illustrations they’re trying
to show you how it works -

He pokes a hole in one point with his pen ...
So they say ’You wanna go from here
to there but it’s too far? A
wormhole bends space like this ...’

He folds the paper over and jams the pen through the second
point, connecting them.
ROMILLY
’So you can take a shortcut across
a higher dimension.’ But to show
that, they’ve turned
three-dimensional space ...
(Gestures around.)
Into two dimensions.
(Hold up paper.)
Which turns the wormhole into two
dimensions ... a circle.
(Indicates hole in paper.)
But what’s a circle in three
dimensions?

COOPER
A sphere.
ROMILLY
Exactly.
(Points out window.)
It’s a spherical hole ...
Cooper marvels at the concept. And at the looming sphere ...
And who put it here? Who do we
thank?
56.


COOPER
I’m not thanking anyone till we get
through it in one piece.


OMITTED
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure"]

Summary Cooper and Doyle examine distorted images of the foreign galaxy through the wormhole from the relay probe. Brand instructs the crew to prepare for entry in 45 minutes. Cooper and Romilly, in the Ranger cockpit, marvel at the spherical shape and discuss the nature of the wormhole, speculating on its origins.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept of a wormhole
  • Visual depiction of space exploration
  • Building anticipation for the mission ahead
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development
  • Some dialogue may be too technical for some audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is engaging, visually captivating, and sets up important elements for the rest of the story. It introduces a key concept and builds anticipation for the journey ahead.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of a wormhole as a gateway to another galaxy is intriguing and sets the stage for the space exploration theme of the film. It introduces a complex scientific idea in a visually compelling way.

Plot: 8

The plot advances as the crew approaches the wormhole, setting up the next phase of their journey. It introduces new challenges and mysteries that will drive the story forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces the concept of a wormhole in a fresh and engaging manner, combining scientific accuracy with character-driven dialogue. The authenticity of the characters' reactions and interactions adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 7

While the focus is more on the concept and setting up the mission, there are moments of interaction between the characters that hint at their relationships and dynamics. Cooper's curiosity and Romilly's excitement add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 5

There are subtle hints at character growth and development, particularly in Cooper's curiosity and Romilly's excitement. The scene sets the stage for potential character arcs as the story progresses.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to understand and come to terms with the concept of a wormhole and the implications of traveling through it. This reflects his curiosity, intelligence, and willingness to explore new frontiers.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to prepare for entering the wormhole and successfully navigating through it to reach the other side. This goal reflects the immediate challenge they are facing in their mission.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there is a sense of tension and anticipation as the crew approaches the wormhole, the conflict is more internal and existential at this point. The main conflict lies in the unknown dangers of space and the mission ahead.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the unknown dangers of traveling through a wormhole and the uncertainty of what lies on the other side. This creates a sense of suspense and conflict that drives the characters' actions.

High Stakes: 8

The high stakes of the mission are emphasized as the crew approaches the wormhole, facing the unknown dangers of space and the quest to find a new home for humanity. The scene sets up the importance and urgency of their mission.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing the concept of the wormhole, setting up the crew's next destination, and building anticipation for the challenges and discoveries to come.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces complex scientific concepts in a way that keeps the audience guessing about the characters' reactions and the outcome of their mission.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the concept of space, time, and higher dimensions. Cooper and Romilly discuss the nature of wormholes and how they bend space to create shortcuts across dimensions. This challenges Cooper's understanding of the universe and his place in it.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of wonder and excitement, as well as a hint of apprehension about the challenges that lie ahead. It sets up an emotional connection to the characters and their mission.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue serves to explain the concept of the wormhole and build anticipation for the upcoming journey. It is informative and sets the tone for the space exploration theme.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it combines scientific concepts with character dynamics, creating a sense of tension and anticipation as the characters prepare to enter the wormhole.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by gradually building tension and excitement as the characters approach the wormhole and prepare to enter it. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi genre, with clear transitions between locations and a focus on technical details and character interactions.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency or tension considering they are approaching a wormhole, which is a pivotal moment in the story.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Romilly explaining the concept of a wormhole feels a bit forced and expository.
  • The visual descriptions could be more vivid to enhance the sense of wonder and awe that should accompany the crew's approach to the wormhole.
  • The interaction between the characters could be more dynamic to add depth and complexity to their relationships.
  • The scene could benefit from more emotional depth and character development to engage the audience on a deeper level.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more tension and urgency to the scene by highlighting the risks and uncertainties of approaching a wormhole.
  • Rewrite the dialogue between Cooper and Romilly to make it more natural and less expository.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more immersive and awe-inspiring atmosphere as they approach the wormhole.
  • Develop the interactions between the characters to add layers to their relationships and make them more engaging for the audience.
  • Infuse more emotional depth and character development into the scene to connect with the audience on a deeper level.



Scene 14 -  Navigating the Wormhole
EXT. WORMHOLE - CONTINUOUS
As the Endurance SWINGS around the wormhole, the view of the
foreign galaxy SWINGS in opposition, like an ENORMOUS
SHAVING MIRROR ... it’s extremely disorienting.
The Endurance fires retro-thrusters to slow, descending
towards the wormhole ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper is at the controls. Doyle is next to him.
COOPER
Any trick to this?
DOYLE
No one knows.
COOPER
(glances at Doyle)
But the others made it, right?
DOYLE
At least some of them.

COOPER
Thanks for the confidence boost.
Cooper stares down into the vast lens of the wormhole.
Everybody ready to say goodbye to
our solar system?

ROMILLY
(over radio)
To our galaxy ...

Cooper pushes the sticks forward, nosing down and letting
gravity PULL them towards the center of the wormhole ...
57.


EXT. WORMHOLE - CONTINUOUS
The Endurance reaches the surface of the wormhole. As it
crosses the threshold it becomes apparent that THERE IS NO
SURFACE ... the craft simply passes into the space of the
distortion, its own warped reflection flickering towards it
as if the ship were leaning into a giant shaving mirror ...

INT. COCKPIT - CONTINUOUS

Cooper and Doyle stare at the distortion of space ahead ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand and Romilly look out at reflections bordering the bulk
- a space beyond our three dimensions ...

EXT. WORMHOLE - CONTINUOUS
The Endurance moves through a TUNNEL OF DISTORTED
REFLECTIONS, seeming to gather more and more dizzying speed,
but getting no closer to the far mouth, as if on an
accelerating treadmill -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper, awestruck, checks his instruments -
DOYLE
They won’t help you in here. We’re
cutting through the bulk - space
beyond our three dimensions ...
(Checks his equipment.)
All we can do is record and
observe.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand JUMPS - a shape in the air in front of her is BENDING,
warping to form ripples in spacetime inside the cabin -
Romilly STARES at the distortion -

ROMILLY
What is that?!
Brand watches the distortion move towards her -
58.


BRAND
I think - I think it’s them.
ROMILLY
Distorting spacetime? Don’t -!

Brand is reaching out towards the warped space - it MOVES
towards her, DISTORTING her hand - but Brand is not in pain
...
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary Endurance's journey through the wormhole induces disorientation and uncertainty. Cooper and Doyle acknowledge the unknowns, while Romilly observes spacetime distortions. Brand experiences a warped space without pain, concluding the scene with awe and anticipation.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Emotional depth
  • Tension-building
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is captivating, combining scientific exploration with emotional depth and tension, keeping the audience engaged throughout.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of traveling through a wormhole to another galaxy is intriguing and well-executed, blending scientific theory with emotional stakes.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly as the characters embark on a journey through the wormhole, setting the stage for the next phase of their mission.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on space exploration, combining scientific accuracy with emotional depth and philosophical inquiry. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging, adding to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters show depth and emotion as they face the unknown, adding layers to their personalities and relationships.

Character Changes: 7

The characters undergo subtle changes as they confront the challenges of the wormhole journey, hinting at further development.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to navigate through the wormhole successfully, reflecting his desire to explore beyond the known universe and potentially find a new home for humanity.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to record and observe the distorted reflections and spacetime inside the wormhole, reflecting the immediate challenge of understanding the unknown dimensions they are traversing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The characters face internal and external conflicts as they venture into the wormhole, adding tension and suspense to the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing the challenge of understanding and navigating through dimensions beyond their comprehension, adding complexity and uncertainty to their mission.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of traveling through the wormhole to find a new home for humanity add urgency and importance to the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a new phase of the mission and raising the stakes for the characters.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' reactions to the distorted reflections and spacetime, adding a sense of tension and mystery to their exploration.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the characters' struggle to comprehend and navigate through dimensions beyond their understanding, challenging their beliefs about the nature of space and time.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a sense of wonder, tension, and curiosity, engaging the audience emotionally.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is effective in conveying the characters' emotions and the gravity of the situation as they navigate the wormhole.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of suspense, wonder, and character dynamics, keeping the audience invested in the characters' journey through the unknown.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense as the characters navigate through the wormhole, creating a sense of urgency and anticipation for what lies ahead.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a sci-fi screenplay, with clear scene headings, action lines, and character dialogue that enhance the visual and narrative flow.

Structure: 8.5

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi genre, with a clear progression of events and character interactions that build tension and intrigue.


Critique
  • The scene effectively conveys the disorienting and awe-inspiring experience of navigating through a wormhole, with vivid descriptions of the distorted reflections and space beyond our three dimensions.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Doyle adds a touch of realism and uncertainty to the scene, as they grapple with the unknown nature of the wormhole and the fate of those who have traversed it before.
  • The visual descriptions of the Endurance passing through the wormhole and the distorted reflections create a sense of tension and wonder, immersing the audience in the experience.
  • The interaction between Brand and Romilly in the Ring Module adds a layer of mystery and intrigue, hinting at the presence of other entities distorting spacetime.
  • Overall, the scene effectively sets up the anticipation and suspense for what lies beyond the wormhole, engaging the audience in the journey into the unknown.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal thoughts or emotions from the characters to deepen the audience's connection to their experiences and uncertainties.
  • Explore the use of sensory details to enhance the disorienting and surreal nature of passing through the wormhole, such as sounds or physical sensations.
  • Introduce subtle hints or foreshadowing of the entities distorting spacetime to build intrigue and anticipation for future developments.
  • Ensure a balance between dialogue, visual descriptions, and character interactions to maintain a dynamic and engaging pace throughout the scene.
  • Consider incorporating moments of reflection or introspection from the characters to provide insight into their mindset and emotional journey through the wormhole.



Scene 15 -  Arrival in the New Galaxy
INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper and Doyle watch the tunnel mouth STREAK towards them,
a mass of stars and nebulae GROWING ...


EXT. FAR SIDE OF THE WORMHOLE - CONTINUOUS
The Endurance slides out of the wormhole.

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Suddenly, the instruments are chirping -
DOYLE
We’re ... here.

Cooper and Doyle look out at the new galaxy ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand’s hand is back to normal. She stares at her fingers.

ROMILLY
What was that?
Brand flexes her fingers, delighted.

BRAND
The first handshake.

EXT. FAR SIDE OF THE WORMHOLE - CONTINUOUS

The cosmos is more CROWDED here - STAR upon STAR, NEBULAE
...
59.

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - LATER
Doyle calls up data on a workstation -

DOYLE
The lost communications came
through -
BRAND
How?
DOYLE
The relay on this side cached them.
Doyle flicks through data -
Years of basic data - no real
surprises. Miller’s site has kept
pinging thumbs up, as has Mann ...
but Edmunds went down, three years
ago.

BRAND
Transmitter failure?
DOYLE
Maybe. He was sending the thumbs up
right till it went dark.

ROMILLY
Miller still looks good?
Doyle nods. Romilly is drawing on a whiteboard -
She’s coming up fast ... with one
complication - the planet is much
closer to Gargantua than we
thought.
COOPER
Gargantua?
DOYLE
A very large black hole. Miller’s
and Dr Mann’s planets orbit it.

BRAND
And Miller’s is on the horizon?
ROMILLY
A basketball around the hoop.
Landing there takes us dangerously
close. A black hole that big has a
huge gravitational pull.
Cooper glances around the concerned faces -
60.


COOPER
Look, I can swing around that
neutron star to decelerate -
BRAND
It’s not that, it’s time. That
gravity will slow our clock
compared to Earth’s. Drastically.
COOPER
How bad?

ROMILLY
Every hour we spend on that planet
will be maybe ... seven years back
on Earth.

COOPER
Jesus -
ROMILLY
That’s relativity, folks.

COOPER
We can’t drop down there without
considering the consequences.
DOYLE
Cooper, we have a mission - COOPER
That’s easy for you to say - you
don’t have anyone back on Earth
waiting for you, do you?
DOYLE
You have no idea what’s easy for
me.
BRAND
Cooper’s right. We have to think of
time as a resource, just like
oxygen and food. Going down there
is going to cost us.
Doyle steps up to the screen, points out three planets.
DOYLE
Look, Dr Mann’s data is promising,
but we won’t get there for months.
Edmunds is even further. Miller
hasn’t sent much, but what she has
sent is promising - water, organics
...
61.

BRAND
You don’t find that every day.
DOYLE No, you do not. So think
about the resources it would take
to come back here ...
They look at each other, considering. Cooper turns to
Romilly -

COOPER
How far off the planet do we have
to stay to be out of the time
shift?
Romilly indicates a spot on his white board.

ROMILLY
Just back from the cusp.
COOPER
So we track a wider orbit of
Gargantua, parallel with Miller’s
planet but a little further out ...
take a Ranger down, grab Miller and
her samples, debrief and analyze
back here

BRAND
That’ll work.
COOPER
No time for monkey business down
there - Tars, you’d better wait up
here. Who else?
ROMILLY
If we’re talking about a couple
years - I’d use that time to work
on gravity - observations from the
wormhole. That’s gold to Professor
Brand.
COOPER
Okay. Tars, factor an orbit of
Gargantua - minimal thrusting -
conserve fuel - but stay in range.
TARS
Don’t worry, I wouldn’t leave you
behind ...
(Swivels around.)
Dr Brand.
She smiles at him.
62.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary After traveling through a wormhole, Cooper and Doyle arrive in a new galaxy. They discover that Brand's hand, which was previously deformed, is now healed. Doyle reports that they have received messages from the other planets, including Miller's and Mann's. Miller's planet is closer to Gargantua than expected, and landing there will significantly slow down their time compared to Earth. Cooper suggests a plan to orbit Gargantua and send a Ranger down to Miller's planet to collect samples. Romilly suggests using the time to study gravity, and Tars agrees to stay in orbit.
Strengths
  • Engaging concept
  • Tense atmosphere
  • Emotional depth
  • Strategic planning
  • Scientific accuracy
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be too technical for general audiences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, emotional depth, and intriguing scientific concepts. It sets up important plot points and character dilemmas effectively.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of time dilation near a black hole, the exploration of a new galaxy, and the strategic planning for a risky mission are all well-developed and add depth to the story.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly with the crew's arrival in the new galaxy, the revelation of the challenges they face, and the decision-making process for the upcoming mission.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique concepts such as time dilation, black holes, and ethical dilemmas in space exploration. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and reflect the challenges of interstellar travel.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show depth through their reactions to the challenges ahead, their conflicting priorities, and their emotional responses to the situation.

Character Changes: 7

The characters face difficult decisions and conflicting priorities, leading to some internal changes and growth, especially in terms of their perspectives on the mission.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal is to make the right decisions for the mission while also considering the impact on his personal life and relationships. He struggles with the idea of sacrificing time with his loved ones for the greater good of the mission.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully navigate the challenges of exploring new planets, making decisions that will impact the success of the mission and the safety of the crew.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the crew's mission objectives, the risks involved, and the personal stakes for each character creates tension and drives the scene forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and ethical dilemmas that challenge the characters' decisions and drive the conflict forward.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the crew faces the challenges of time dilation, the risks of exploring a new galaxy, and the strategic decisions that could impact the future of humanity.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing key challenges, setting up the mission objectives, and deepening the characters' dilemmas.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces new challenges and dilemmas for the characters, keeping the audience guessing about the outcome of their decisions.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the concept of time as a resource and the ethical implications of sacrificing time for the mission. Cooper and Brand debate the value of time and the consequences of their decisions on Earth and their personal lives.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The emotional depth of the characters, the high stakes of the mission, and the personal dilemmas faced by each crew member contribute to a strong emotional impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the scientific concepts, the characters' emotions, and the strategic planning discussions, adding depth to the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it presents high-stakes decisions, scientific concepts, and emotional conflicts that keep the audience invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a balance of technical exposition, character interactions, and decision-making moments that keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and follows the expected format for a screenplay, with proper scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi genre, with a focus on technical details, character interactions, and decision-making moments. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency or tension considering the gravity of the situation. The crew has just arrived in a new galaxy after passing through a wormhole, which should evoke a sense of wonder, excitement, and perhaps even fear, but these emotions are not effectively conveyed in the scene.
  • The dialogue feels somewhat flat and lacks depth. There is a lot of exposition and technical information being shared, but it doesn't engage the audience or create a connection with the characters.
  • The conflict between the crew members regarding the decision to visit Miller's planet is not fully explored or resolved. There is potential for more emotional depth and character development in this conflict that is not fully realized in the scene.
  • The visual descriptions could be more vivid and immersive to help the audience visualize the new galaxy and the impact of being near Gargantua. Adding more sensory details could enhance the scene and make it more engaging.
  • The scene could benefit from more character interactions and dynamics to create a sense of camaraderie, tension, or conflict among the crew members. This would add depth to the relationships and make the scene more compelling.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more emotional depth and character development to the scene to engage the audience and create a stronger connection with the characters.
  • Enhance the dialogue to make it more engaging and reflective of the characters' emotions, motivations, and conflicts.
  • Add more sensory details and vivid descriptions to bring the new galaxy and the impact of being near Gargantua to life for the audience.
  • Explore the conflict between the crew members regarding the decision to visit Miller's planet in more depth, and consider how it can add tension and emotional resonance to the scene.
  • Include more character interactions and dynamics to create a sense of camaraderie, tension, or conflict among the crew members, adding depth to the relationships and making the scene more compelling.



Scene 16 -  Descent to Miller's Planet
EXT. BLACK HOLE, GARGANTUA - DAY
A black sphere sucking light from the cosmos, visible by its
distorting effect on the light of stars behind it - squeezed
into a GLOWING, CURVED HORIZON. The Endurance approaches.


INT. RANGER COCKPIT - DAY
Cooper looks out at Gargantua. Doyle peers over his shoulder

DOYLE
A literal heart of darkness ...
Brand points to a small glowing planet nearer the blackness.
BRAND
There’s Miller’s planet.
Cooper turns to Case, the machine riding shotgun.
COOPER
Ready?

CASE
Yup.
COOPER
Don’t say much, do you?

CASE
Tars talks plenty for both of us.
Cooper chuckles as he throws a final switch -

COOPER
Detach -

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

The Ranger DETACHES from the ring module, like an X-1 from a
B-29, FIRES retro-thrusters to slow and ... DROPS -

EXT. THE BLACK HOLE, GARGANTUA - DAY

The Ranger SHOOTS down towards Gargantua -
63.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper is in awe at their acceleration -
COOPER
(into radio)
Romilly, you reading these forces?

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Romilly studies data, marveling.
ROMILLY
Unbelievable.
(Looks out at Gargantua.)
If we could see the collapsed star
inside, the singularity, we’d solve
gravity.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper looks down at the eerie blackness sliding beneath -
COOPER
No way to get anything from it?
ROMILLY
(over radio)
Nothing escapes that horizon. Not
even light. The answer’s there,
just no way to see it.


EXT. GARGANTUA - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger looks tiny as it STREAKS over the blackness, high
above the GLOWING HORIZON. It is approaching Miller’s
planet, a gleaming dark-blue world ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper studies his trajectory.

CASE
This is fast for atmospheric entry.
Should we use the thrusters to
slow?
64.


COOPER
We’re gonna use the Ranger’s
aerodynamics to save the fuel.
CASE
Air brake?
COOPER
Wanna get in fast, don’t we?
CASE
Brand, Doyle, get ready.

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger STREAKS down towards the planet. It starts to
encounter the STRATOSPHERE -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
The craft starts to HOWL and SHAKE. Cooper studies the
curving horizon, concentrating -
CASE
We should ease -
COOPER
Hands where I can see them, Case!
Only time I ever went down was a
machine easing at the wrong moment
-
CASE
A little caution -
COOPER
Can get you killed, same as
reckless.

DOYLE
Cooper! Too damn fast!
COOPER
I got this.

Cooper squeezes the shaking controls with white knuckles -
CASE
Should I disable the feedback?
65.


COOPER
No! No, I need to feel the air ...

EXT. STRATOSPHERE, MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

The Ranger glows WHITE HOT, slicing through FLAT CLOUDS -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper peers out at the razor-like layers of cloud -
COOPER
Do we have a fix on the beacon?
CASE
Got it. Can you maneuver?
COOPER
Gotta shave more speed. I’ll try
and spiral down on it -

Doyle looks at Brand, nervous. She takes a breath.

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger CUTS through cloud formations, BURSTING out into
CLEARER AIR, HIGH ABOVE AN ENDLESS OCEAN -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
The crew peer at SPARKLING WATER, streaking below them -

DOYLE
Just water.
BRAND
The stuff of life ...

CASE
Twelve hundred meters out.
Cooper BANKS sharply, eases down.

BRAND
It’s shallow. Feet deep ...
66.


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger is low now, kicking up backwash -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

CASE
Seven hundred meters ...
Cooper peers ahead -

COOPER
Wait for it ...
CASE
Five hundred meters ...

Cooper YANKS the stick -
COOPER
Fire!


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger’s retro-rockets FIRE - killing the craft’s speed
just feet from the surface. Water SPRAYS UP as the Ranger
SLEWS diagonally, gear is lowered, the Ranger drops, its
landing gear holding it just above the shallow water.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Everyone BOUNCES with the impact. Then BREATHES.

BRAND
Very graceful.
COOPER
No. But it was very efficient.
(Looks at them.)
What’re you waiting for? Go!
Brand and Doyle hurry out of their harnesses, helmets on.
Case moves to the hatch. With a CRACK, the hatch opens and
LIGHT and SPRAY whip inside ...
67.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure"]

Summary The Ranger spacecraft crew approaches Miller's planet, detaching from the Endurance module. Despite concerns from Doyle, Cooper pilots the Ranger through intense acceleration and atmospheric entry, successfully landing in shallow water. The crew disembarks to explore the planet.
Strengths
  • Engaging tension and excitement
  • Visually captivating descriptions of space exploration
  • Introduction of complex scientific concepts
Weaknesses
  • Dialogue could be more nuanced and character-specific

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, excitement, and awe, as the crew navigates the challenges of approaching a black hole and descending onto a mysterious planet. It sets up a sense of wonder and danger, keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a black hole, gravity, and a new planet is intriguing and well-executed. The scene effectively introduces these complex scientific ideas in a visually captivating way.

Plot: 9

The plot is well-developed, focusing on the crew's mission to explore Miller's planet near the black hole Gargantua. The tension and excitement build as they approach the planet, setting the stage for further discoveries and challenges.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on space exploration by focusing on the intense moments of navigating through a black hole and landing on a new planet. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the setting.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show determination, fear, and awe as they face the challenges of space exploration. Their reactions and interactions add depth to the scene, enhancing the overall narrative.

Character Changes: 7

The characters show growth and adaptation as they face the challenges of space exploration, particularly in their reactions to the unknown and the dangers they encounter.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to navigate the spacecraft safely through the black hole and land on Miller's planet. This reflects his desire to explore and discover new worlds, as well as his fear of failure or danger in the unknown.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully land the spacecraft on Miller's planet and gather information. This goal reflects the immediate challenge of navigating through the black hole and executing a precise landing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict arises from the crew's daring descent onto Miller's planet near the black hole, facing the unknown dangers and uncertainties of space exploration.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing challenges and obstacles in navigating through the black hole and landing on the planet. The audience is kept on edge by the uncertainty of the outcome.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the crew approaches a black hole and descends onto a mysterious planet, facing unknown dangers and uncertainties in space exploration.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by introducing the crew's descent onto Miller's planet near the black hole Gargantua, setting the stage for further exploration and discoveries in space.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unknown dangers of navigating through a black hole and landing on a new planet. The characters face unexpected challenges that keep the audience on edge.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between the characters' desire for exploration and discovery, and the inherent dangers and unknowns of space travel. This challenges their beliefs about the importance of knowledge and the risks involved in seeking it.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a range of emotions, from awe and excitement to tension and fear, as the crew navigates the challenges of space exploration. The emotional depth adds to the overall impact of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is functional, conveying necessary information and emotions. It could be more impactful with added depth and character-specific nuances.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it combines high-stakes action with character dynamics and technical details of space travel. The tension and excitement keep the audience invested in the outcome of the mission.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and technical details that maintain the tension and excitement of the space exploration mission.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene follows the expected format for a sci-fi screenplay, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue. The visual descriptions enhance the reader's understanding of the setting and action.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi space exploration genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and formatting enhance the tension and excitement of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene effectively sets up the tension and anticipation as the crew approaches the black hole, Gargantua, and Miller's planet.
  • The dialogue between the characters adds depth to their interactions and personalities, showcasing Cooper's determination and Case's cautiousness.
  • The visual descriptions of the spacecraft descending towards Miller's planet and the intense atmospheric entry create a vivid and engaging image for the audience.
  • The scene effectively conveys the high stakes and risks involved in the mission, especially with Cooper's white-knuckled control of the spacecraft during the descent.
  • The use of details like the glowing horizon, the white-hot glow of the Ranger, and the sparkling water below adds to the immersive quality of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal thoughts or emotions for the characters to deepen their characterization and provide insight into their motivations.
  • Explore the sensory experiences of the characters during the atmospheric entry to enhance the tension and excitement of the scene.
  • Provide more context or foreshadowing about the significance of Miller's planet and the potential challenges they may face upon landing.
  • Consider incorporating more visual cues or descriptions to enhance the visual impact of the scene and immerse the audience further in the setting.
  • Ensure a clear transition or build-up towards the next scene to maintain the momentum and engagement of the audience.



Scene 17 -  Race Against the Wave
EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - MOMENTS LATER (DAY)
Case climbs quickly from the craft, knee deep in the water.
Brand and Doyle follow. Case TRACKS the beacon.
CASE
This way, about two hundred meters.
Brand and Doyle peer into the distance. Smooth, ankle-deep
water to the horizon, where a distant MOUNTAIN RANGE LOOMS.
They start splashing towards it in their heavy spacesuits
...
DOYLE
(panting)
The gravity’s punishing ...

BRAND
Floating through space too long?
CASE
One hundred and thirty percent
Earth gravity.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper listens to their chatter, IMPATIENT.

COOPER
(under his breath)
Come on ...

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

Doyle falls behind. Brand pushes on. Ahead, Case stops.
CASE
Should be here.

Brand joins him, searching the shallows for some sign of
Miller’s mission. She looks up, confused.
BRAND
If the signal’s coming from here -

Case DROPS to his knees THRASHING under the water, like a
bear fishing. Doyle arrives -
DOYLE
What’s he doing?
68.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper notices something. In the distance. The mountains -

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

Case WRENCHES a piece of DAMAGED EQUIPMENT from the sea bed.
BRAND
Her beacon ...

Case starts lugging the beacon to the Ranger.
DOYLE
Wreckage. Where’s the rest ...?

BRAND
Towards the mountains!
She starts moving fast towards some FLOATING OBJECTS.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper is staring out at the horizon -
COOPER
Those aren’t mountains ...


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Brand pauses -

COOPER
(over radio)
They’re waves -
Brand looks closer - the ’mountains’ are moving, tiny lines
of white sea spray are blowing from the tops ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks the other direction ... there is a MOUNTAIN
WAVE BEARING DOWN ON THE SHIP ...
69.


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Brand is searching the wreckage -.
COOPER
(over radio)
Brand, get back here!
BRAND
We need the recorder -

Doyle looks from Brand to Case, who is loading the beacon.
Beyond him Doyle sees the mountain wave approaching -
DOYLE
Case, go get her!
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary Astronauts search for a crucial device on an alien planet, but a towering wave threatens their mission as they remain oblivious to its approach.
Strengths
  • Tension-filled atmosphere
  • High stakes
  • Engaging plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development in the scene
  • Some dialogue could be more impactful

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, suspense, and action. It keeps the audience on the edge of their seats with the imminent danger the characters face.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a new planet with unexpected dangers and high gravity adds depth and intrigue to the scene. The discovery of the massive waves creates a unique and thrilling situation for the characters.

Plot: 9

The plot is driven by the characters' exploration of the planet and the unexpected danger they encounter. The discovery of the waves adds a new layer of conflict and urgency to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique setting with the water-covered planet and the looming mountain wave, creating a fresh and visually striking environment for the characters to navigate. The dialogue and actions of the characters feel authentic and contribute to the tension and suspense of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters' reactions to the situation showcase their determination and quick thinking in the face of danger. Their interactions and decisions drive the plot forward and add depth to their personalities.

Character Changes: 7

The characters are forced to adapt and make quick decisions in response to the danger they face, showcasing their ability to overcome challenges and work together in a crisis.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to find the beacon and complete Miller's mission. This reflects their desire to fulfill their duty and honor their fallen comrade.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to retrieve the beacon and any other wreckage from the planet. This reflects the immediate challenge of navigating the harsh environment and avoiding the approaching mountain wave.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is high, as the characters are faced with a life-threatening situation that requires quick thinking and decisive action. The impending danger of the approaching waves creates a sense of urgency and tension.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing multiple challenges and obstacles that threaten their mission and their lives.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes in the scene, with the characters facing a life-threatening situation on an unknown planet, create a sense of danger and urgency that drives the action and keeps the audience engaged.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a new obstacle for the characters to overcome and setting the stage for further exploration and conflict. It advances the plot and raises the stakes for the characters.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the sudden appearance of the mountain wave and the characters' unexpected reactions to the changing situation.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is the tension between duty and survival. The characters must balance their commitment to completing the mission with the need to stay alive in the face of the planet's dangers.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes fear, confusion, and determination in the characters, which resonates with the audience and creates an emotional connection to the story. The high stakes and imminent danger add to the emotional impact of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene is focused on conveying urgency and danger. It effectively communicates the characters' reactions and decisions in the face of the impending threat.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, fast-paced action, and the looming threat of the mountain wave. The characters' interactions and the unfolding mystery of the planet's dangers keep the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a balance of action and character moments that keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and character dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, rising action, and a cliffhanger ending that propels the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clear descriptions of the characters' emotions and reactions to the intense situation they are in. Adding more emotional depth to their actions and dialogue would enhance the audience's connection to the characters.
  • The dialogue feels a bit rushed and lacks natural flow. Consider adding pauses, interruptions, or internal thoughts to make the conversation more realistic and engaging.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions of the surroundings on Miller's planet to create a vivid and immersive setting for the audience.
  • There is a missed opportunity to build tension and suspense as the crew faces the approaching mountain wave. Adding more suspenseful elements and a sense of urgency would heighten the dramatic impact of the scene.
  • The transition between the cockpit and the external action on Miller's planet could be smoother to maintain the continuity of the scene and keep the audience engaged.
Suggestions
  • Add internal monologues or reactions from the characters to convey their thoughts and emotions in the intense situation.
  • Revise the dialogue to include more natural pauses, interruptions, and emotional nuances to make it more engaging.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions of the surroundings on Miller's planet to create a more immersive setting for the audience.
  • Build tension and suspense by emphasizing the approaching mountain wave and the urgency of the situation.
  • Ensure a smoother transition between the cockpit and the external action to maintain the flow of the scene.



Scene 18 -  The Mountain Wave
INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper hits the dash, frustrated.
COOPER
Dammit! Brand, get back here!

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Brand sloshes along, checking DEBRIS -

BRAND
We can’t leave without her data -
COOPER
(over radio)
You don’t have time!
Case is back at Doyle.
DOYLE
Go, go!

Case takes off towards Brand, who is trying to lift a piece
of equipment from the water. She drops it and moves on -

EXT. RANGER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper swings open the hatch, stands in the doorway, peering
out at the approaching mountain waves - turns back to Brand
-
70.

COOPER
Get back here! Now!

Brand has pulled something heavy from the wreckage - she
SLIPS, the wreckage PINNING her down ... She looks back at
the Ranger - sees the mountain wave THOUSANDS OF FEET HIGH
ALMOST UPON THEM -
BRAND
Cooper, go! Go! I can’t make it!
Cooper looks at Case RACING towards her -
COOPER
Get up, Brand!

BRAND
GO! GET OUT OF HERE!
Case THROWS her onto his back and starts running. Doyle
stands, mesmerized by the sheer liquid mountain face ...

COOPER
Doyle! Come on! Case has her!
Doyle turns, starts sloshing back, the water RUNNING against
his ankles now ... Two hundred yards behind, Case POUNDS
through the shallows, Brand on his back -
Cooper looks up at the EVER CLOSER MOUNTAIN WAVE - jumps
inside.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper powers up, as the wall of liquid fills his view.
COOPER
Come on, come on ...
He sees the water right upon them - RUNS back to the hatch.
Doyle is at the foot of the ladder, Case RUNNING FAST.
DOYLE
Go!
Case JUMPS up the ladder, THROWS Brand inside - TURNS for
Doyle. The Ranger TILTS, RISES - DOYLE IS RIPPED FROM CASE’S
HAND - WATER RAGES ACROSS THE OPEN HATCH -

COOPER
Shut the hatch!
Case shuts the hatch. Cooper is throwing switches -
71.


COOPER
Power down! Power down! We have to
ride it out!
(To Brand, furious.)
We are not prepared for this!


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Doyle is DRAGGED under and away. The Ranger is SUCKED
SIDEWAYS up the face of the mountain -


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Brand and Cooper are thrown across the cockpit. Case GRABS
Brand, pulls her into her seat - Cooper holds on as the
craft ROLLS and ROLLS -

EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger reaches the top of the wave, rocks upright -


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper drops into his seat as the water pours off the canopy
-


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger tilts over the backside of the wave, SURFING for
a second then PITCHING FORWARD - TUMBLING DOWN 8,000 FEET
...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
They hang on for dear life, THRASHED MERCILESSLY -


EXT. MILLER’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger comes AGROUND as the wave leaves it behind ...
72.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
The craft comes to rest. Cooper jumps to the controls,
powers up the electrics. The engines won’t respond -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary During a mission on Miller's Planet, a group of astronauts face danger. Cooper urges Brand to return to the Ranger due to an approaching mountain wave. Brand hesitates, intent on gathering data. Case rescues Brand and they attempt to escape the wave, but Doyle is tragically lost. The Ranger is caught in the wave and tumbles violently, but eventually comes to rest with damaged engines.
Strengths
  • Intense action
  • Emotional depth
  • High stakes
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Possible lack of clarity in some action sequences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, emotion, and high stakes. The urgency of the situation and the characters' reactions make it a compelling and impactful moment in the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a dangerous alien planet and facing a natural disaster adds depth to the sci-fi adventure narrative. The scene effectively conveys the challenges and risks involved in space exploration.

Plot: 9

The plot is driven by the characters' struggle to survive the impending disaster on the alien planet. The scene advances the story by introducing a critical turning point that will have significant consequences for the characters and their mission.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its depiction of a unique and dangerous environment, as well as the characters' desperate struggle for survival. The dialogue feels authentic and adds to the realism of the situation.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters' reactions and decisions under pressure reveal their strengths, vulnerabilities, and relationships. Their actions in the face of danger add depth to their personalities and drive the emotional impact of the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant changes as they are forced to confront their fears, make difficult decisions, and rely on each other for survival. The experience on the alien planet tests their resilience and adaptability.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to save Brand and Doyle, reflecting his deep desire to protect his crew and fulfill his mission as a pilot.

External Goal: 8

Cooper's external goal is to navigate the dangerous mountain waves and escape the planet with his crew intact.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and immediate, as the characters face a life-threatening situation with limited time to react. The struggle to survive against nature's forces creates a sense of urgency and danger.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong, with the characters facing overwhelming odds and uncertain outcomes.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are incredibly high in the scene, as the characters face a life-threatening situation with limited time to escape. The risk of failure is immense, adding tension and urgency to the narrative.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a critical obstacle that the characters must overcome. The outcome of their struggle on the alien planet will have lasting consequences for their mission and the future of humanity.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' unpredictable actions and the constantly shifting dangers they face.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the value of sacrifice and self-preservation. Brand is willing to sacrifice herself for the greater good, while Cooper is determined to save everyone at any cost.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions of fear, desperation, and determination in the characters and the audience. The high stakes and intense action heighten the emotional impact of the scene.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is focused on conveying urgency, fear, and determination. It effectively communicates the characters' emotions and motivations in the midst of a life-threatening situation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, intense action, and emotional character dynamics.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and keeps the audience on the edge of their seats as the characters face escalating challenges.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene effectively conveys the fast-paced action and chaotic nature of the events unfolding.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a clear and engaging structure, building tension and conflict as the characters face escalating challenges.


Critique
  • The scene effectively conveys a sense of urgency and danger as the crew faces the approaching mountain wave on Miller's Planet.
  • The tension is well-built through the escalating actions of the characters, such as Brand trying to salvage data while being pinned down by wreckage and Cooper's frantic attempts to get everyone back to safety.
  • The visual descriptions of the mountain wave and the Ranger's struggle against it create a vivid and intense atmosphere for the scene.
  • The dialogue effectively conveys the urgency and desperation of the situation, with characters like Brand and Cooper urging each other to escape the impending danger.
  • The scene effectively sets up a high-stakes situation that leaves the audience on the edge of their seats, wondering how the crew will survive the mountain wave.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal thoughts or emotions for the characters to deepen the audience's connection with their experiences during the crisis.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating more sensory details to enhance the immersive quality of the scene, such as the sound of the rushing water or the feeling of being tossed around in the cockpit.
  • Ensure that the resolution of the scene maintains the same level of tension and excitement to keep the audience engaged in the story.
  • Consider adding a moment of reflection or aftermath after the immediate danger has passed to allow the characters and audience to process the intensity of the situation.
  • Continue to build on the strong visual and descriptive elements to create a vivid and impactful portrayal of the crew's struggle against the mountain wave.



Scene 19 -  Race Against Time
EXT. RANGER - CONTINUOUS
The gear LIFTS the Ranger. Water FLOODS out -


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper tries the engines again. Nothing.

CASE
Too waterlogged. Let it drain.
COOPER
(hits console)
GODDAMN!

BRAND
I told you to leave me.
COOPER
And I told you to get your ass back
here! Difference is, only one of us
was thinking about the mission -
BRAND
Cooper, you were thinking about
getting home - I was trying to do
the right thing!
COOPER
Tell that to Doyle.
Quiet. Cooper looks down at the clock. Bitter.
How long to drain, Case?
CASE
Forty-five to an hour.

Cooper shakes his head. Pulls his helmet off.
COOPER
The stuff of life, huh? What’s this
gonna cost us, Brand?

BRAND
A lot. Decades.
Cooper rubs his face. Mind reeling. Trying to breathe.
73.


COOPER
What happened to Miller?
BRAND
Judging by the wreckage, she was
broken up by a wave soon after
impact.
COOPER
How could the wreckage still be
together after all these years?

BRAND
Because of the time slippage. On
this planet’s time, she landed here
just hours ago. She might’ve only
died minutes ago.

Case indicates the beacon.
CASE
The data Doyle received was just
the initial status, echoing
endlessly.
Cooper takes this in. Breathes hard. Takes off his gloves.
COOPER
We’re not prepared for this, Brand.
You’re a bunch of eggheads without
the survival skills of a boy-scout
troop.
BRAND
We got this far on our brains -
farther than any humans in history
-
COOPER
Not far enough. And we’re stuck
here till there won’t be anyone
left on Earth to save -
BRAND
I’m counting every second, same as
you, Cooper.

Cooper takes this in. They’re in the same boat.
COOPER
Don’t you have some clever way we
jump into a black hole and get back
the years?
74.


She shakes her head, dismissive.
COOPER
Don’t just shake your head at me -!
BRAND
Time is relative - it can stretch
and squeeze - but it can’t run
backwards. The only thing that can
move across dimensions like time is
gravity.

COOPER
(thinks)
The beings who led us here ... they
communicate through gravity ...

Brand nods.
Could they be talking to us from
the future?
BRAND
(considers)
Maybe ...
COOPER
Well, if they can -
BRAND
Look, Cooper, they’re creatures of
at least five dimensions - to them
time may be just another physical
dimension. To them the past might
be a canyon they can climb into and
the future a mountain they can can
climb up ... but to us it’s not,
okay?
Brand pulls her helmet off. Looks Cooper in the eyes.

BRAND
I’m sorry, Cooper. I screwed up.
But you knew about relativity.
COOPER
My daughter was ten. I couldn’t
explain Einstein’s theories before
I left.
BRAND
Could you tell her you were going
to save the world?
75.


COOPER
No. I wasn’t much of a parent, but
I understood the most important
thing - let your kids feel safe.
Which rules out telling a
ten-year-old that the world’s
ending.
CASE
Cooper?

Case is pointing out at another MOUNTAIN RANGE.
COOPER
How long for the engines?
CASE
A minute or two -
COOPER
We don’t have it!
The mountain wave is approaching. Cooper tries the engines -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Adventure"]

Summary Ranger submerges, engines waterlogged. Time dilation and gravity discussed. Another wave approaches. Engines still won't start.
Strengths
  • Intense emotional impact
  • Compelling dialogue
  • Strong character development
  • High stakes and tension
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may feel slightly melodramatic at times

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful, with intense emotions, high stakes, and significant character development. The tension is palpable, and the dialogue is powerful, driving the narrative forward and engaging the audience.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of time dilation, survival skills, and the communication through gravity adds depth to the scene. The exploration of relativity and the consequences of past decisions are thought-provoking and enhance the overall narrative.

Plot: 9

The plot is gripping, with the characters facing a life-threatening situation and grappling with the repercussions of their actions. The scene moves the story forward significantly and sets the stage for further conflict and development.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique concepts such as time slippage, gravity communication, and philosophical discussions on relativity. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and add to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with complex emotions and motivations. Their interactions reveal their inner struggles and add depth to the narrative. The scene showcases strong character dynamics and growth.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant emotional and psychological changes in the scene, particularly Cooper and Brand. They confront their past decisions, face the consequences of their actions, and grapple with the weight of responsibility, leading to personal growth and development.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to come to terms with his past decisions and reconcile with the consequences of leaving his daughter behind. This reflects his deeper need for redemption and understanding.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to survive the harsh conditions of the planet and find a way back home. This reflects the immediate challenges they are facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is high, with the characters facing a life-or-death situation and struggling to make difficult choices. The tension is palpable, and the stakes are raised as they confront the harsh reality of their predicament.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing difficult challenges and conflicting beliefs. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome, adding to the tension and drama.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes in the scene are extremely high, with the characters facing a life-threatening situation and the potential loss of decades of progress. The decisions they make will have far-reaching consequences, adding to the tension and urgency of the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, setting up new challenges and conflicts for the characters. It propels the narrative towards the next stage of the journey and builds anticipation for the resolution of the plot.

Unpredictability: 8.5

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in the characters' decisions and the looming danger of the mountain wave. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the situation will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the concept of time and relativity. Cooper and Brand have differing views on how to approach the situation, reflecting their beliefs and values.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a significant emotional impact, evoking feelings of tension, regret, and empathy for the characters. The intense emotions and high stakes draw the audience in and create a sense of urgency and suspense.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is intense, emotional, and impactful. It drives the scene forward, revealing the characters' thoughts and feelings in a compelling way. The exchanges between the characters add depth and tension to the narrative.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its intense dialogue, philosophical conflicts, and emotional depth. The characters' actions and decisions keep the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense. The rhythm of the dialogue and action sequences keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to its effectiveness.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency and tension considering the imminent danger of the approaching mountain wave.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Brand feels somewhat forced and lacks emotional depth, especially given the gravity of the situation.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional turmoil and conflict between the characters as they face a life-threatening situation.
  • The exposition about time slippage and the concept of gravity communication feels rushed and could be better integrated into the dialogue for more impact.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the sense of danger and urgency as the mountain wave approaches.
Suggestions
  • Add more emotional depth to the interactions between Cooper and Brand to convey the gravity of the situation and their conflicting perspectives.
  • Build up the tension and urgency as the mountain wave approaches to create a more suspenseful atmosphere.
  • Consider revising the dialogue to make it more natural and impactful, focusing on the emotional stakes of the characters.
  • Integrate the exposition about time slippage and gravity communication more seamlessly into the dialogue to enhance the audience's understanding and engagement.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more vivid and immersive depiction of the approaching danger and the characters' reactions.



Scene 20 -  Reunion and Regrets
EXT. RANGER - CONTINUOUS
The rockets COUGH and steam ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper tries the engines again. Close. But no ignition.
COOPER
Helmets on!
The wave is upon them ...
COOPER
Blow our cabin oxygen through the
main thrusters. We’ll spark it -
Case hits a button - a HISS and SHRIEK of gas escaping ...
Brand seals her helmet just as the cockpit DEPRESSURIZES -

COOPER
Come on, now ...
Cooper hits the engines - they BLAST TO LIFE -
76.


EXT. RANGER - CONTINUOUS
A fiery BLAST sends the Ranger clear of the mountain wave.
Down below, Doyle’s body lies in the shallows, about to be
swept up into the next rush of water ...


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - DAY
Romilly watches as Cooper and Brand enter the Endurance.

BRAND
Hello, Rom.
ROMILLY
I’ve waited years.

COOPER
How many years?
ROMILLY
By now ... it must be -

TARS
Twenty-three years ...
Cooper’s head lowers.

TARS
... four months, eight days.
Cooper turns away.
ROMILLY
Doyle?
Brand’s eyes flicker down. She shakes her head. She grasps
Romilly’s hands, looks up into his eyes, vulnerable -
BRAND
I thought I was prepared. I knew
all the theory. Reality’s
different.
ROMILLY
And Miller?
BRAND
There’s nothing here for us.
Brand looks at Romilly’s wrinkles. His greying beard.
77.


BRAND
Why didn’t you sleep?
ROMILLY
I did a couple of stretches. But I
stopped believing you were coming
back, and something seems wrong
about dreaming your life away. I
learned what I could from studying
the black hole, but I couldn’t send
anything to your father. We’ve been
receiving, but nothing gets out.
She looks up at Romilly, not wanting to ask ...
BRAND
Is he still alive?

Romilly nods. Brand closes her eyes with relief.
ROMILLY
We’ve got years of messages stored
...

Brand opens her eyes, looks for Cooper. He is in the comm.
booth. He SHUTS the privacy curtain. She looks down.

INT. COMMUNICATIONS BOOTH, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Cooper studies the machine like it might bite him.
COOPER
Cooper.

COMPUTER VOICE
Messages span twenty-three years -
COOPER
I know.
(Whispers.)
Just start at the beginning.
Cooper leans forward as the screen flickers to life: Tom,
still seventeen, turns on the camera.

TOM
Hi, Dad -
Cooper pauses it. Prepares himself. Lets it run -
78.

TOM
I met another girl, Dad. I really
think this is the one -

Tom holds up a picture of himself and a teenage GIRL.
Murph stole Grandpa’s car. She
crashed it - she’s okay, though.
Your truck’s still running -
Grandpa said she should steal that
next time. I said if she did it’d
be the last thing she did ...
Cooper leans back ...


INT. COMMUNICATIONS BOOTH, ENDURANCE - DAY
Cooper is holed up, still watching, unshaved. He’s been
watching for days. On the screen, Tom is in his twenties -
TOM
I’ve got a surprise for you, Dad.
You’re a grandpa ...
Tom holds up an infant wrapped tight in swaddling.
Congratulations. Meet Jesse.

Cooper smiles a tearful smile.
Grandpa said he already earned the
’great’ part so we just leave it at
that.

The screen cuts out. Then comes back on. Tom in his thirties
-
Hi, Dad. I’m sorry it’s been
awhile. What with Jesse and all ...
He stops, emotional.
Grandpa died last week. We buried
him out in the back forty, next to
Mom and Jesse.
(Looks down.)
Where we’d have buried you, if
you’d ever come back.
(Looks up.)
Murph was there for the funeral. I
don’t see her so much anymore.
(Sighs.)
You’re not listening to this. I
know that. All these messages are
just out there, drifting in the
darkness ... I figured as long as
they were willing to send them
there was some hope, but ...
79.


(Pauses.)
You’re gone. You’re never coming
back. And I’ve known that for a
long time. Lois says - that’s my
wife, Dad - she says I have to let
you go. So I am.
(Reaches up to turn off
camera.)
Wherever you are, I hope you’re at
peace. Goodbye, Dad.

The screen goes black. Tears are streaming down Cooper’s
face. He stares at the black screen, wiping his face. He
starts to get up - the screen flickers to life once more -
A beautiful WOMAN of about forty has turned on the camera -
she looks at us, unsure about this. Makes a start -

WOMAN
Hello, Dad. You sonofabitch.
Cooper peers into the face, recognizing -

COOPER
(whispers)
Murph?
WOMAN (MURPH)
I never made one of these when you
were still responding cos I was so
mad at you for leaving. When you
went quiet, it seemed like I should
just live with my decision. And I
have ...
(Looks around.)
But today’s my birthday. And it’s a
special one because you once told
me -
She stops, unable to speak for a second.

MURPH
You once told me that when you came
back we might be the same age ...
and today I’m the age you were when
you left ...
(Starts crying.)
So it’d be a real good time for you
to come back.
Murph reaches up, switches off the camera and we stay with
her in -
80.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary After escaping a deadly mountain wave, the Ranger crew reunites with Romilly on the Endurance. Cooper receives messages from his children, learning of his father's survival and his own missed moments. Murph's message, now the same age as Cooper when he left, brings him both joy and sadness.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Strong character development
  • Engaging dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Some moments of exposition may be heavy-handed

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally powerful, with strong character development and high stakes. The dialogue is poignant and the themes are thought-provoking.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of long-distance communication through space and time, as well as the exploration of gravity and its role in interstellar travel, is intriguing and well-executed.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with tension and conflict driving the narrative forward. The scene moves the story along significantly and sets up important character dynamics.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the theme of family relationships and the impact of time, with a focus on the emotional consequences of long-distance communication and absence.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and their emotional journeys are compelling. The relationships between them are complex and add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant emotional changes throughout the scene, particularly in their relationships with each other and their understanding of their circumstances.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with the passage of time and the impact of his absence on his family. He is grappling with feelings of guilt, regret, and longing for connection.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to establish communication with his family on Earth and receive updates on their lives. He is also trying to navigate the challenges of space travel and survival.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

There is a high level of conflict in the scene, both internally within the characters and externally in the face of the challenges they are facing. This conflict drives the emotional intensity of the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene comes from the protagonist's internal struggles, the challenges of space travel, and the emotional barriers between characters. The audience is kept on edge by the uncertainty of how these conflicts will be resolved.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene, both in terms of the characters' personal relationships and the success of the space mission. The outcome of their decisions has significant consequences.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing key information about the characters, their relationships, and the challenges they face. It sets up important plot points for the rest of the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the emotional twists and turns, unexpected revelations, and the raw vulnerability of the characters. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the characters will react or what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around themes of time, family, and the consequences of one's choices. Cooper is faced with the reality of the impact of his decisions on his loved ones and the passage of time.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene has a profound emotional impact on the audience, eliciting feelings of sadness, longing, and empathy. The heartfelt moments between the characters resonate deeply.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is heartfelt and realistic, capturing the emotional turmoil of the characters. It effectively conveys the themes of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, character development, and the sense of longing and connection between the characters. The audience is drawn into the intimate moments and emotional journey of the protagonist.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-crafted, with a balance of emotional moments, character interactions, and plot progression. The rhythm of the scene enhances the impact of key revelations and character dynamics.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and concise, following the expected format for its genre. The transitions between locations and character interactions are smooth and effective.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a well-paced structure that effectively conveys the emotional weight and character development. The dialogue and actions flow naturally, leading to a powerful climax.


Critique
  • The scene is intense and suspenseful, effectively conveying the urgency and danger the characters are facing.
  • The dialogue and actions of the characters are engaging and drive the tension of the scene.
  • The visual descriptions of the Ranger being lifted out of the water and the fiery blast sending it clear of the mountain wave are vivid and impactful.
  • The emotional impact of Cooper watching the video messages from his family is well portrayed, showing the passage of time and the toll of his absence on his loved ones.
  • The revelation of Murph's message at the end adds a poignant and emotional layer to the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal thoughts or emotions for Cooper during the intense moments to deepen the audience's connection with his character.
  • Provide more context or visual cues to enhance the understanding of the mountain wave and its imminent threat.
  • Explore the aftermath of Doyle's death and its impact on the remaining crew members to add depth to the scene.
  • Consider incorporating more sensory details to immerse the audience in the high-stakes situation and increase the tension.
  • Ensure a smooth transition between the intense action sequences and the emotional moments to maintain a cohesive narrative flow.



Scene 21 -  Afraid of Time
INT. COMMUNICATION ROOM, NASA - DAY
Murph brings her hand down from the camera. Wipes her tears.

PROFESSOR BRAND
(O.S., softly)
I didn’t mean to intrude.
Murph turns to see Professor Brand, now ELDERLY, in a
WHEELCHAIR in the doorway.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I’ve never seen you in here before.
Murph rises -

MURPH
I’ve never been in here before.
Murph wheels Professor Brand out into the corridor.


INT. CURVING CORRIDOR, NASA - MOMENTS LATER
Murph pushes Professor Brand.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I talk to Amelia all the time. It
helps. I’m glad you’ve started -
MURPH
I haven’t. I just had something I
wanted to get out.


INT. PROFESSOR BRAND’S OFFICE - MOMENTS LATER
Professor Brand wheels behind his desk.

PROFESSOR BRAND
I know they’re still out there.
MURPH
I know.

PROFESSOR BRAND
There are so many reasons their
communications might not be getting
through.

MURPH
(smiles gently)
I know, Professor.
81.


PROFESSOR BRAND
I’m not sure which I’m more afraid
of ... they never come back, or
they come back to find we’ve
failed.

She watches his introspection. Brings him back with -
MURPH
Then let’s succeed.

PROFESSOR BRAND
(gestures at formula)
So, back from the fourth iteration,
let’s run it with a finite set.
Murph has picked up a notebook. Pauses.

MURPH
With respect, Professor. We’ve
tried that hundreds of times.
PROFESSOR BRAND
And it only has to work once,
Murph.
She shrugs. Starts to work.


INT. LAUNCH FACILITY - LATER
Murph and Professor Brand sit, eating sandwiches on a
walkway. WORKERS move about the CIRCULAR CHAMBER, building
more SIDEWAYS INFRASTRUCTURE. Professor Brand looks down,
proud.

PROFESSOR BRAND
Every rivet they drive in could
have been a bullet. We’ve done well
for the world, here. Whether or not
we crack the equation before I kick
-
MURPH
Don’t be morbid, Professor.

PROFESSOR BRAND
I’m not afraid of death, Murph. I’m
an old physicist - I’m afraid of
time.
82.


INT. PROFESSOR BRAND’S OFFICE - MOMENTS LATER
Murph stands before the algebra. She REALIZES something.
MURPH
Time ... you’re afraid of time ...

CONVINCED, she TURNS -
Professor, the equation ...?
He looks up.
For years we’ve tried to solve it
without changing the underlying
assumptions about time -
PROFESSOR BRAND
And?

MURPH
And that means each iteration
becomes an attempt to prove its own
proof - it’s recursive. Nonsensical
-

PROFESSOR BRAND
(sharp)
Are you calling my life’s work
’nonsense’, Murph?

MURPH
No, I’m saying you’ve been trying
to finish it with one arm - no,
with both arms tied behind your
back ...

Murph focuses on Professor Brand, suddenly WARY ...
... and I don’t understand why.
Professor Brand looks down. Starts wheeling his chair.

PROFESSOR BRAND
I’m an old man, Murph. Could we
pick this up some other time? I’d
like to go talk to my daughter.
Murph nods. Looking at the Professor. Confused.

PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
Stepping out into the universe, we
must first confront the reality
that nothing in our solar system
can help us ...
83.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Murph and Professor Brand confront their fears and work together to solve the equation.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Thematic exploration
  • Poignant dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Limited plot progression
  • Lack of external conflict

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene is emotionally impactful, with strong character development and thematic depth. The dialogue is engaging and thought-provoking, contributing to the overall quality of the scene.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of time, failure, and perseverance is central to the scene, offering a deep exploration of these themes. The scene challenges traditional notions of success and presents a complex view of the characters' struggles.

Plot: 7

While the plot progression is limited in this scene, the focus on character dynamics and thematic exploration adds depth to the narrative. The scene sets up important emotional and philosophical groundwork for future developments.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh perspectives on scientific challenges and personal relationships, offering a unique blend of emotional depth and intellectual exploration. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging, contributing to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed and showcase internal conflicts and growth. Their interactions reveal layers of complexity and add depth to the scene. The emotional depth of the characters enhances the overall impact of the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo internal changes and growth in this scene, particularly in their reflections on time, failure, and perseverance. Their interactions and dialogue reveal new facets of their personalities and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal in this scene is to understand and challenge Professor Brand's approach to solving the equation, reflecting her desire for success and her willingness to question established beliefs.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to help solve the equation and ensure the success of the mission, reflecting the immediate challenge of time constraints and the pressure to find a solution.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

The conflict in this scene is more internal and emotional, focusing on the characters' struggles with time, failure, and the weight of their responsibilities. While there is tension, it is primarily driven by the characters' internal conflicts.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting beliefs and goals between the characters. The uncertainty of the outcome adds tension and complexity to the narrative.

High Stakes: 7

The stakes are high in this scene, as the characters grapple with the weight of their responsibilities, the fear of failure, and the uncertainty of their mission. The emotional and philosophical stakes are particularly impactful.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene does not significantly advance the plot in terms of external events, it deepens the thematic and emotional layers of the narrative. It sets up important character dynamics and philosophical groundwork for future developments.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the dialogue and character interactions. The philosophical conflict and emotional depth add layers of complexity and unpredictability to the scene.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the approach to solving the equation and the fear of failure or time running out. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs in traditional methods and the importance of innovation.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of hope, regret, and resignation. The characters' struggles and the weight of their decisions resonate with the audience, creating a powerful emotional connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant, reflective, and thought-provoking. It adds depth to the characters and explores complex themes effectively. The conversations between characters drive the emotional and philosophical aspects of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its blend of emotional depth, intellectual challenges, and character dynamics. The dialogue and interactions between Murph and Professor Brand create a sense of urgency and emotional resonance.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional depth, maintaining a balance between dialogue and action. It keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character cues, and dialogue formatting. It adheres to industry standards and enhances readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a structured format that effectively balances dialogue, action, and character development. It maintains a cohesive narrative flow and builds tension effectively.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency or tension, considering the gravity of the situation and the high stakes involved in trying to solve the equation to save humanity.
  • The dialogue between Murph and Professor Brand feels somewhat flat and lacks emotional depth, especially given the weight of the conversation about the fate of the astronauts and the future of humanity.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to create a vivid and immersive setting, enhancing the overall impact of the interaction between Murph and Professor Brand.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional turmoil and conflict faced by both characters, particularly in relation to their fears and hopes for the future.
  • The resolution of the scene feels somewhat abrupt and lacks a clear sense of closure or progression in terms of the characters' development and the overarching narrative.
Suggestions
  • Introduce more tension and urgency by highlighting the imminent threat of time running out and the need to solve the equation quickly.
  • Enhance the emotional depth of the dialogue by exploring the characters' inner struggles, fears, and motivations in a more nuanced and compelling way.
  • Include more visual cues and descriptive elements to create a visually engaging and immersive setting that enhances the emotional impact of the scene.
  • Focus on developing the characters' arcs and relationships further, particularly in terms of their personal growth, conflicts, and resolutions.
  • Consider revising the ending of the scene to provide a more satisfying and impactful conclusion that leaves the audience with a sense of anticipation and intrigue.



Scene 22 -  The Planet Decision
INT. COMMUNICATIONS BOOTH, ENDURANCE - NIGHT
Brand watches her father on screen.
PROFESSOR BRAND
(V.O.)
... then we must confront the
realities of interstellar travel.
We must venture far beyond the
reach of our own life spans. We
must think not as individuals, but
as a species ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - DAY
Romilly, Brand, Cooper, Tars and Case sit in discussion.

COOPER
Tars kept the Endurance right where
we needed her, but it took years
longer than we anticipated ...

Cooper puts both planets on screen - Dr Mann’s ice world,
and Edmunds’ desert planet.
COOPER
We don’t have the fuel to visit
both prospects. We have to choose.

ROMILLY
How? They’re both promising.
Edmunds’ data was better, but Dr
Mann is the one still transmitting.

BRAND
We’ve got no reason to suppose
Edmunds’ results would have soured.
His world has key elements to
sustain human life -

COOPER
As does Dr Mann’s.
BRAND
Cooper, this is my field. And I
really believe Edmunds’ is the
better prospect.
COOPER
(challenging)
Why?
84.


BRAND
Gargantua, that’s why.
(Steps to board.)
Look at Miller’s world -
hydrocarbons, organics, yes. But no
life. Sterile. We’ll find the same
thing on Dr Mann’s.
ROMILLY
Because of the black hole?

BRAND
(nods)
Murphy’s Law - whatever can happen
will happen. Accident is the first
building block of evolution - but
when you’re orbiting a black hole
not enough can happen - it sucks in
asteroids and comets, random events
that would otherwise reach you. We
need to go to further afield.
COOPER
You once referred to Dr Mann as the
’best of us’.
BRAND
He’s remarkable. We’re only here
because of him.

COOPER
And he’s there on the ground
sending an unambiguous message that
we should go to that planet.

Brand is silent. Romilly looks from Brand to Cooper.
ROMILLY
Should we vote?

COOPER
If we’re going to vote, there’s
something you need to know. Brand?
She says nothing.
He has a right to know.

BRAND
That has nothing to do with it.
ROMILLY
What does?
85.

COOPER
She’s in love with Wolf Edmunds.

ROMILLY
(to Brand)
Is that true?
BRAND
Yes. And that makes me want to
follow my heart. But maybe we’ve
spent too long trying to figure all
this with theory -
COOPER
You’re a scientist, Brand -

BRAND
I am. So listen to me when I tell
you that love isn’t something we
invented - it’s observable,
powerful. Why shouldn’t it mean
something?
COOPER
It means social utility - child
rearing, social bonding -

BRAND
We love people who’ve died ...
where’s the social utility in that?
Maybe it means more - something we
can’t understand, yet. Maybe it’s
some evidence, some artifact of
higher dimensions that we can’t
consciously perceive. I’m drawn
across the universe to someone I
haven’t seen for a decade, who I
know is probably dead. Love is the
one thing we’re capable of
perceiving that transcends
dimensions of time and space. Maybe
we should trust that, even if we
can’t yet understand it.

Brand looks at Romilly, who can’t meet her eye.
BRAND
Cooper, yes - the tiniest
possibility of seeing Wolf again
excites me. But that doesn’t mean
I’m wrong.
Cooper thinks back to his conversation with Donald.
86.


COOPER
Honestly, Amelia ... it might.
Romilly looks at Brand. It’s clear she’s lost.
COOPER
Tars, set the course for Dr Mann.
Brand is starting to tear up. She turns away.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary The crew debates visiting Dr. Mann's ice world or Edmunds' desert planet. Brand advocates for Edmunds' planet due to her connection to him, but Cooper challenges her judgment. Despite Brand's emotional appeal, Cooper decides to prioritize Dr. Mann's planet.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Philosophical dialogue
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Some may find the dialogue too philosophical or melodramatic

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally impactful, with intense dialogue and high stakes. It delves into complex themes and character dynamics, moving the story forward significantly.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of choosing between two potential planets for colonization, intertwined with the theme of love and trust, is compelling and thought-provoking.

Plot: 8

The plot is driven by the characters' decisions and conflicts, leading to a crucial choice that will impact the future of humanity.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh perspective on the intersection of science and emotion, presenting a unique take on the characters' decision-making process. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are well-developed, with complex motivations and relationships. Their interactions drive the emotional core of the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo emotional and psychological changes, particularly in their perspectives on love, trust, and the unknown.

Internal Goal: 8

Brand's internal goal in this scene is to reconcile her personal feelings for Wolf Edmunds with her scientific beliefs and responsibilities. She struggles with the conflict between following her heart and making a rational decision based on scientific evidence.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to make a decision on which planet to visit for potential colonization, balancing scientific data with personal connections and beliefs.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

There is a high level of internal and external conflict, particularly in the characters' emotional struggles and the decision-making process.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and emotional revelations challenging the characters' beliefs and decisions.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high, both personally and for the mission, as the characters must choose between two potential planets with unknown risks and rewards.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly advances the plot, setting up a crucial decision that will shape the future of the mission and the characters' relationships.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected emotional revelations and philosophical debates that challenge the characters' beliefs and decisions.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the nature of love and its role in decision-making. Brand argues for the importance of love as a guiding force, while Cooper emphasizes the practical and rational aspects of their decision.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions, including sadness, hope, and tension, as the characters grapple with difficult choices and personal revelations.

Dialogue: 9

The dialogue is rich, engaging, and reveals the characters' inner thoughts and conflicts. It sparks philosophical debates and emotional revelations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, emotional conflicts, and philosophical debates that drive the narrative forward.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, keeping the audience engaged in the characters' emotional and philosophical struggles.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene descriptions and character dialogue.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear character motivations and conflicts driving the narrative forward.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency and tension considering the gravity of the decision being made.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Brand feels somewhat forced and overly expository, lacking in emotional depth.
  • The conflict between the characters could be more effectively portrayed to create a more engaging and dynamic scene.
  • The emotional stakes of the decision between Dr. Mann's ice world and Edmunds' desert planet could be heightened to make the choice more impactful.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual cues or actions to enhance the storytelling and engage the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more emotional depth to the dialogue between Cooper and Brand to make their conflict more compelling.
  • Introduce more visual elements or actions to convey the characters' emotions and the gravity of the decision being made.
  • Focus on building tension and urgency in the scene to keep the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.
  • Explore different ways to portray the characters' internal struggles and conflicting motivations to add complexity to the scene.
  • Consider revising the dialogue to make it more natural and reflective of the characters' personalities and relationships.



Scene 23 -  Difficult Decisions
EXT. OUTER SPACE - MOMENTS LATER
The thrusters FIRE, pushing the Endurance out of its orbit
of Gargantua.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - LATER
Brand is checking her POPULATION BOMB. Cooper enters.
COOPER
Brand, I’m sorry.

BRAND
Why? You’re just being objective.
(Beat.)
Unless you’re punishing me for
screwing up on Miller’s planet.

COOPER
This wasn’t a personal decision for
me.
Brand turns from her equipment. Looks him in the eye.

BRAND
Well, if you’re wrong, you’ll have
a very personal decision to make.
(Off look.)
Your fuel calculations are based on
a return journey. Strike out on Dr
Mann’s planet, and we’ll have to
decide whether to return home, or
push on to Edmunds’ planet with
Plan B. Starting a colony could
save us from extinction.
She closes the population bomb.
You might have to decide between
seeing your children again ... and
the future of the human race.
(Smiles bitterly.)
(MORE)
87.

BRAND (cont’d)
I trust you’ll be as objective,
then.


EXT. OUTER SPACE - CONTINUOUS
The Endurance sinks past a GLORIOUS NEBULA whose GOLDEN
MISTS DISSOLVE TO ROILING BLACK CLOUDS and we are -


EXT. FARMHOUSE - DAY
Murph stands with Tom, now late forties. Watching a field
BURN.
TOM
We’ll lose about a third this
season. But next year ... I’m gonna
start working Nelson’s fields.
Should make it up.

MURPH
What happened to Nelson?
Tom glances at her. Don’t ask. Heads for the house.


INT./EXT. FARMHOUSE - DUSK
Murph at family dinner with Tom, LOIS, and their
six-year-old son COOP.
LOIS
Will you stay the night? We left
your room like it was ...
Murph looks down, awkward ...
MURPH
No, I need to ...
Murph looks upstairs. At Lois.
Too many memories, Lois.
She nods. Coop helps Tom clear. As Coop takes Murph’s plate
he starts COUGHING. Looks up at her, sees her concern,
GRINS.
COOP
The dust.

He and Tom head into the kitchen.
88.


MURPH
I have a friend who should look at
his lungs, Lois.
She nods, is about to speak. Tom sits back down.

Pull back to reveal the glowing windows against the
darkening plain, dust clouds rolling across the horizon ...

INT. CORRIDOR, NASA - NIGHT

Murph hurries down a corridor with a doctor, GETTY.
GETTY
He started asking for you after he
came to, but we couldn’t raise you
-

INT. HOSPITAL ROOM, NASA - MOMENTS LATER
Murph is at Professor Brand’s bedside. He is hooked up to
machines. Barely breathing.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Murph ... Murph ...
Murph takes his hand with gentle concern.

MURPH
I’m here, Professor.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I don’t have much life ...
(Breathes.)
I have to tell you ...
MURPH
Try to take it easy.

PROFESSOR BRAND
All these ... years. All these
people ... counted on me ...
MURPH
It’s okay, Professor.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I let you ... all you ... down.
89.


MURPH
No. I’ll finish what you started.
Professor Brand looks up into Murph’s eyes, tears welling.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Murph. Good, good Murph. Such faith
... all these years, I told you to
have faith ... to believe ...
MURPH
I do believe -
PROFESSOR BRAND
I needed you to believe your father
was coming back ...

MURPH
I do, Professor -
PROFESSOR BRAND
Forgive me, Murph ...

MURPH
There’s nothing to forgive.
PROFESSOR BRAND
I lied, Murph. I lied to you ...

Murph looks at Professor Brand, confused.
PROFESSOR BRAND
There’s no reason to come back ...
no way to help us ...

MURPH
But Plan A - all this - all these
people ... the equation!
But Professor Brand slowly shakes his head, tears rolling
down. As Murph tries to comprehend, he settles, DRIFTING.
MURPH
(whispers)
Did he know?

Nothing.
Did my dad know?!
Nothing.
Did he abandon me?!
90.


PROFESSOR BRAND
Do ... not ... go...
She leans in to hear.
PROFESSOR BRAND
Gentle ... into ... into ...
MURPH
NO! NO! Professor, stay! You can’t!
You can’t leave ...

Getty is at her shoulder.
MURPH
You can’t, you can’t, you ...

Getty puts his hand on her shoulder. She sits there. Stuck.
As Professor Brand goes still ...
MURPH
(V.O.)
Dr Brand, I’m sorry to tell you
that your father died today ...
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Drama"]

Summary The Endurance orbits Gargantua, and Cooper apologizes to Brand. Brand believes it's because of her error on Miller's planet. Cooper informs her of a potential choice between Dr. Mann's and Edmunds' planets. If they go to Dr. Mann's planet, they risk running out of fuel for their return. Brand confronts Cooper with the choice between seeing his children and securing the human race's future. Cooper vows objectivity. The Endurance navigates a nebula. On Earth, Murph and Tom witness a field burning. Tom predicts crop loss but expresses optimism for recovery. Murph inquires about Nelson, but Tom evades her question. At the farmhouse, Lois invites Murph to stay, but she declines, citing overwhelming memories. Cooper coughs, and Murph suggests a medical consultation with a friend. Murph and a doctor visit Professor Brand at NASA. Dying, Professor Brand reveals his lie to Murph. He claims no reason exists for their return or means of assistance. Murph confronts him about Cooper's knowledge, but Professor Brand urges her to stay. He passes away, leaving Murph devastated.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Revelation of deception
  • Exploration of themes
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly dramatic

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally charged, with high stakes and significant character development. It effectively conveys the weight of the decisions made by the characters and sets up important plot points for the rest of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of sacrifice for the greater good, the revelation of deception, and the exploration of time and gravity as key elements in the narrative are well-executed. These concepts drive the emotional and plot development in the scene.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the revelation of Professor Brand's deception and the impact it has on Murph. The decision-making process regarding the next planet to visit adds tension and sets up future conflicts.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh perspectives on space exploration, human relationships, and moral dilemmas, offering a unique take on familiar sci-fi themes. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and emotionally resonant.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters show depth and complexity, especially in their emotional responses to the events unfolding. Murph's confrontation with Professor Brand and Cooper's internal struggle with his decisions showcase strong character development.

Character Changes: 9

Murph undergoes a significant character change as she confronts the truth about her father and Professor Brand's deception. This confrontation challenges her beliefs and sets her on a new path of understanding and growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Brand's internal goal is to maintain her composure and professionalism while dealing with personal and professional challenges. This reflects her need for control and her fear of failure.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to make crucial decisions about the future of the mission and the survival of humanity. This reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges they are facing in space exploration.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, as characters grapple with difficult decisions and the consequences of their actions. The revelation of deception creates tension and sets up future external conflicts.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting values, emotional obstacles, and moral dilemmas that challenge the characters' beliefs and decisions, creating suspense and uncertainty for the audience.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters face decisions that could determine the fate of humanity. The revelation of deception and the weight of responsibility add tension and urgency to the scene.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing crucial information, setting up future conflicts, and deepening the emotional stakes for the characters. It propels the narrative towards its climax and resolution.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected emotional revelations, moral twists, and character dynamics that challenge the audience's expectations and assumptions.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the value of sacrifice for the greater good versus personal desires and relationships. Brand must weigh the importance of saving humanity against her own emotional attachments and desires.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotionally impactful, eliciting feelings of sadness, regret, and hope in the audience. The characters' struggles and the weight of their decisions resonate deeply, creating a powerful emotional connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotional turmoil and conflict within the characters. It reveals important information about the characters' motivations and drives the scene forward.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional intensity, moral complexity, and high stakes. The audience is drawn into the characters' dilemmas and conflicts, creating a sense of suspense and empathy.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension, emotional resonance, and thematic complexity, creating a dynamic and engaging narrative flow that keeps the audience invested in the characters' dilemmas and decisions.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene adheres to the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting. The visual descriptions and action lines enhance the reader's understanding of the setting and character dynamics.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a well-defined structure that effectively balances character interactions, emotional beats, and thematic development. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the scene's effectiveness and engagement.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clarity in terms of the characters' emotions and motivations. Cooper's apology to Brand feels forced and unclear, as it's not entirely clear what he is apologizing for.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Brand is somewhat stilted and lacks depth. The emotional weight of the decision they are facing is not fully explored in the conversation.
  • The transition from the outer space setting to the farmhouse scene feels abrupt and disjointed, making it difficult for the audience to follow the narrative flow.
  • The emotional impact of Professor Brand's confession and subsequent passing is not fully realized. The scene could benefit from more nuanced and impactful dialogue and interactions between Murph and Professor Brand.
  • The scene lacks a clear resolution or closure, leaving the audience with unanswered questions and a sense of incompleteness.
Suggestions
  • Clarify Cooper's apology to Brand by providing more context and depth to their relationship and the situation they are in.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Cooper and Brand to better convey the weight of the decision they are facing and the emotional stakes involved.
  • Smooth out the transition between the outer space setting and the farmhouse scene to improve the overall coherence of the scene.
  • Develop the emotional arc of Professor Brand's confession and passing by adding more emotional depth and impactful dialogue between him and Murph.
  • Provide a more satisfying resolution to the scene by addressing the unanswered questions and providing a sense of closure to the audience.



Scene 24 -  Unexpected Discovery and Confrontation
INT. COMMUNICATION ROOM, NASA - DAY
Murph, controlled anger, sits in front of the camera.

MURPH
He had no pain and was ... at
peace. I’m sorry for your loss.
She reaches to switch off the camera. STOPS. Acid.
Did you know, Brand? Did he tell
you ...?

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - DAY

Murph’s voice rings through the empty ship. Only Case there
to register it.
MURPH
(V.O.)
Did you know that Plan A was a sham
...?! You left us here. To die.
Never coming back ...
Through the window we see the Ranger moving away, towards -
91.

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY
The Endurance orbits the silvery white globe as the Ranger
heads towards the planet.

EXT. STRATOSPHERE - MOMENTS LATER
The Ranger drops through layers of large, MOUNTAINOUS CLOUD.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper and Tars, Brand and Romilly. Cooper peers out,
concerned, studying a heads-up display of CLOUD DENSITY ...


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger cuts through one cloud, banks left and SCRAPES
AGAINST THE NEXT ’CLOUD’, PANELS TEARING FROM THE WING - THE
CLOUDS ARE ACTUALLY SOLID ICE FORMATIONS ...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper banks away from the ICE, glancing out at the damage -


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger moves cautiously through the ’cloudscape’ like a
ship through an ice field ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Romilly and Brand put their helmets on. Tars indicates the
beacon’s position. Cooper looks, BANKS the Ranger.


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger’s gear lowers as it comes to rest, tentatively,
at the base of what looks like a large CUMULUS CLOUD.


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - LATER
Cooper leads them up the ICE CLOUD. From a distance, they
are walking on a cloud. Tars brings up the rear.

Cooper crests a ridge. SPOTS something. He starts down
towards a dirty orange dot in the cloudscape.
92.


EXT. DR MANN’S POD - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper is there. The others arrive at the large metal pod -
WEATHERED and DAMAGED over the years, half buried in ice.
Nearby, various WIRE MARKERS stick out of the ice. Tars
starts digging out the hatch.


INT. DR MANN’S POD - LATER
A CRACK of COLD LIGHT, as the outer hatch is wrenched open.
Cooper steps through the airlock, into a CRYPT-LIKE SPACE -
Cooper’s hand sweeps ice from the nameplate of a
cryo-chamber, ’DR MANN’.
Tars fires up the cryo-chamber. The ice starts to melt.

Cooper, helmet off, CRACKS the lid, pushes it back,
revealing a figure in a plastic shroud. Cooper rips the seal
...
Dr Mann’s eyes flicker open. He watches Cooper, breathing,
focusing - reaches up with TREMBLING hands - GRABS Cooper -
PULLS himself up, CHEEK AGAINST CHEEK - SOBBING - hands
desperately CARESSING Cooper’s face. Cooper holds him tight.
COOPER
(whispering)
It’s okay. It’s okay.

INT. SAME - LATER
Dr Mann sits, blanket over his shoulders, sipping from a
steaming cup. He looks at their faces, marveling.
DR MANN
(cracked, parched)
Pray you never learn just how good
it can be to see another face.
(Shaky sip.)
I hadn’t much hope to begin with.
After so much time, I had none. My
supplies were exhausted. The last
time I went to sleep, I set no
waking date.
(Looks at them all.)
You have literally raised me from
the dead.
93.

COOPER
(smiles)
Lazarus.

DR MANN
(nods)
And the others?
ROMILLY
I’m afraid you’re it, sir.
DR MANN
So far, surely?
COOPER
With our situation, there’s not
much hope of any other rescue.
This hits Dr Mann hard. He looks down at his tea.
BRAND
Dr Mann, tell us about your world.
DR MANN
(smiles gently)
My world. Yes. Our world, we hope.
Our world is cold, stark ...


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY
Dr Mann leads the others up to the summit of a cloud.

DR MANN
(V.O.)
But undeniably beautiful ...
From the top, they watch the planet’s pale sun setting.

DR MANN
The days are sixty-seven cold
hours, the nights are sixty-seven
far colder hours ...

They make their way back into the shelter.
DR MANN
(V.O.)
The gravity is a very pleasant 80
percent of Earth’s. Up here, where
I landed, the ’water’ is alkali and
the ’air’ has too much ammonia in
it to breathe for more than a few
minutes ...
94.

Brand checks readings on Dr Mann’s instruments.

INT. DR MANN’S POD - NIGHT

The crew are captivated by Dr Mann ...
DR MANN
But down at the surface, and there
is a surface ... the chlorine
dissipates and the ammonia gives
way to crystalline hydrocarbons and
breathable air. To organics.
Possibly even to life.
(Off looks.)
Yes. We may be sharing this world.

BRAND
(giddy)
These readings are from the
surface?

Brand is reviewing Dr Mann’s piles of data.
DR MANN
Over the years I’ve dropped various
probes.

COOPER
How far have you explored?
DR MANN
I’ve mounted several major
expeditions, but with oxygen in
limited supply, Kipp there had to
do most of the legwork.
Dr Mann indicates a DEFUNCT ARTICULATED MACHINE.
TARS
What’s wrong with him?
DR MANN
Degeneration. He misidentified the
first organics we found as ammonia
crystals. We struggled on for a
time, but ultimately, I
decommissioned him and used his
power source to keep the mission
going.
(Remembers, sadly.)
I thought I was alone before I shut
him down.
95.


TARS
Would you like me to look at him?
DR MANN
No, I think he needs a human touch.

Tars turns to Brand.
TARS
Dr Brand, Case is relaying a
message for you from the comm.
station.
She nods.
MURPH
(V.O.)
... He had no pain and was ... at
peace.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Murph accuses Dr. Brand of abandoning them. The Ranger encounters ice clouds, damaging it. Cooper rescues Dr. Mann, who explains his planet's conditions. Brand examines promising data from the planet's surface.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • World-building
Weaknesses
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue
  • Limited action sequences

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

This scene is highly impactful, combining emotional depth, tension, and ethical dilemmas in a science fiction setting. The reunion with Dr. Mann adds layers of complexity to the story and raises the stakes for the characters.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of exploring a new planet, encountering a lone survivor, and facing the moral dilemma of sacrificing personal desires for the greater good is compelling and thought-provoking.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the crew's arrival on Dr. Mann's planet, the discovery of his survival, and the decision-making process regarding their next steps. The scene is pivotal in setting up future conflicts and decisions.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique elements such as the ice clouds on the planet and the cryo-chamber, adding a fresh perspective to the familiar theme of space exploration. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters show depth, vulnerability, and growth in this scene. Dr. Mann's emotional reaction to being rescued, Cooper's empathy and leadership, and Brand's scientific curiosity all contribute to the richness of the character dynamics.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters undergo significant changes in this scene, particularly Dr. Mann, who transitions from despair to hope upon being rescued. Cooper also shows growth in his empathy and leadership skills, while Brand grapples with ethical dilemmas.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal is to confront the betrayal and abandonment she feels from the other characters, particularly Brand, and to seek answers about the deception surrounding Plan A.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to rescue Dr. Mann and gather information about the new planet they have discovered.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict in the scene arises from the ethical dilemma of choosing between personal desires and the future of humanity. The tension between the characters' emotional needs and their responsibilities adds depth to the narrative.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Dr. Mann's deception and the challenges of the new planet creating obstacles for the characters to overcome.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high in this scene as the characters must decide between personal desires and the survival of humanity. The choices they make will have far-reaching consequences, adding tension and urgency to the narrative.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing new challenges, dilemmas, and character dynamics. It sets the stage for future conflicts and decisions that will shape the course of the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the characters' decisions and the discovery of new information about the planet and Dr. Mann.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around themes of trust, survival, and sacrifice. Dr. Mann's actions and decisions challenge the protagonist's beliefs about humanity's capacity for selflessness and deception.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the characters and the audience, ranging from joy and relief to sorrow and regret. The reunion with Dr. Mann and the weight of the decisions ahead create a powerful emotional impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotions, conflicts, and ethical dilemmas faced by the characters. It drives the scene forward and reveals important information about the characters' motivations and relationships.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, emotional conflicts, and suspenseful moments that keep the audience invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and suspense, with a balance of action sequences and emotional moments that keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for a sci-fi screenplay, with clear scene headings and descriptions of locations and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with distinct locations and character interactions. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in building tension and emotional depth.


Critique
  • The transition between Murph's confrontation with Dr. Brand in the communication room at NASA and the scene on Dr. Mann's planet feels abrupt and disjointed.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth in the interaction between Cooper and Dr. Mann upon their reunion, considering the gravity of the situation and the years of isolation Dr. Mann endured.
  • The dialogue between the characters on Dr. Mann's planet feels somewhat expository and could benefit from more natural and engaging interactions.
  • The scene lacks a clear focus on the emotional impact of the characters' experiences, especially considering the weight of the revelations about Plan A being a sham and the crew being left to die on Earth.
  • The visual descriptions could be enhanced to create a more vivid and immersive setting for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition between the scenes to maintain the flow of the narrative.
  • Work on deepening the emotional connection between Cooper and Dr. Mann to reflect the intensity of their reunion after years of isolation.
  • Revise the dialogue to make it more engaging and natural, focusing on character dynamics and emotional depth.
  • Ensure that the emotional impact of the revelations about Plan A and the crew being left on Earth is fully explored and conveyed in the scene.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more immersive and vivid setting for the audience, adding depth to the scene.



Scene 25 -  The Truth Unveiled: Plan B Revealed
INT. DR MANN’S POD - LATER

Brand watches Murph’s message on Tars’ data screen.
MURPH
I’m sorry for your loss.
Brand STARES. Cooper is there. Murph reaches up -

BRAND
(abstract)
Is that Murph?
Cooper nods.
She’s become a -
MURPH
(acid)
Did you know, Brand? Did he tell
you? That Plan A was a sham ...?!

Cooper looks at Brand, who is shocked.
You left us here to set up your
colony. Never coming back ...

Murph does not want to ask, tears are running down her
cheeks -
(Small.)
Did my father know? Dad ...?
Cooper stares. Murph’s eyes bore into his ...
Did you leave me here to die?
96.


The screen goes dark. Cooper stands there, SHOCKED.
BRAND
Cooper, my father devoted his whole
life to Plan A - I have no idea
what she means -

DR MANN
(O.S.)
I do.

They turn. Dr Mann looks at them with gentle calm.
COOPER
He never even hoped to get people
off the Earth.

DR MANN
No.
BRAND
But he’s been trying to solve the
gravity equation for forty years!

Dr Mann comes over, looks into Brand’s eyes.
DR MANN
Amelia, your father solved his
equation before I even left.

BRAND
Then why wouldn’t he use it?!
DR MANN
The equation couldn’t reconcile
relativity with quantum mechanics.
You need more -
COOPER
More what?!

DR MANN
More data. You need to see inside a
black hole. And the laws of nature
prohibit a naked singularity.

COOPER
(to Romilly)
Is that true?
ROMILLY
If a black hole is an oyster, the
singularity is the pearl inside.
(MORE)
97.


ROMILLY (cont’d)
Its gravity is so strong, it’s
always hidden in darkness, behind
the horizon. That’s why we call it
a black hole.

COOPER
If we could look beyond the horizon
-
DR MANN
Some things aren’t meant to be
known.
(To Brand.)
Your father had to find another way
to save the human race from
extinction. Plan B. A colony.

BRAND
Why not tell people? Why keep
building that damn station?
DR MANN
He knew how much harder it would be
for people to come together and
save the species, instead of
themselves ...
(To Cooper, sympathetic.)
Or their children.
COOPER
Bullshit.
DR MANN
Would you have left if you hadn’t
believed you were trying to save
them? Evolution has yet to
transcend that simple barrier - we
can care deeply, selflessly for
people we know, but our empathy
rarely extends beyond our line of
sight.
BRAND
But the lie. A monstrous lie ...

DR MANN
Unforgivable. And he knew it. Your
father was prepared to destroy his
own humanity to save our species.
He made the ultimate sacrifice.
98.


COOPER
No. That’s being made by the people
of Earth who’ll die because, in his
arrogance, he declared their case
hopeless.

DR MANN
I’m sorry, Cooper. Their case is
hopeless. We are the future.
Cooper REELS. Brand puts her hand on his shoulder -

BRAND
Cooper, what can I do?
He turns to her. Looks her in the eyes.

COOPER
Let me go home.
And the sound of WIND in DRY CORNSTALKS takes us -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Dr. Mann discloses that Plan A was abandoned due to scientific limitations. Plan B, creating a space colony, was chosen instead. Cooper and Brand confront Mann, questioning the deception. Mann defends Professor Brand's decision as a necessary sacrifice, while Cooper condemns it as a lie that will condemn those on Earth. The scene concludes with Cooper pleading with Brand to help him return home.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Revelation of crucial information
  • Exploration of moral dilemmas
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly expository

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful, revealing crucial information, and delving deep into the emotional and moral dilemmas faced by the characters.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of sacrificing personal relationships for the greater good, the revelation of a monumental lie, and the exploration of the complexities of human nature are compelling and thought-provoking.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the revelation of the lie, the decision-making process regarding the future of humanity, and the emotional turmoil faced by the characters.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and complex scientific concepts, explores moral dilemmas in a unique way, and presents characters with conflicting motivations and beliefs. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are deeply affected by the revelations and decisions they must make, showcasing their internal struggles, moral dilemmas, and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant emotional and moral changes as they grapple with the revelations and decisions they must make.

Internal Goal: 8

Brand's internal goal in this scene is to understand the truth behind her father's actions and decisions regarding Plan A and Plan B. This reflects her deeper need for closure and clarity about her father's legacy and motivations.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to figure out a way to save humanity from extinction, which is directly related to the immediate challenges they are facing in the narrative.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict arises from the revelation of the lie, the decision-making process regarding the future of humanity, and the emotional turmoil faced by the characters.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing moral dilemmas, conflicting beliefs, and difficult decisions that challenge their motivations and actions.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters must make decisions that will impact the future of humanity, sacrificing personal relationships for the greater good.

Story Forward: 9

The scene significantly moves the story forward by revealing crucial information, advancing character development, and setting the stage for future events.

Unpredictability: 8.5

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces unexpected twists, reveals shocking truths, and challenges the characters' beliefs and motivations in surprising ways.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the ethical dilemma of sacrificing individual lives for the greater good of humanity. It challenges the protagonist's beliefs about sacrifice, morality, and the value of honesty.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions through the characters' internal struggles, moral dilemmas, and the sacrifices made for the greater good.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is intense, emotional, and thought-provoking, revealing the inner conflicts and moral dilemmas of the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it reveals crucial information, raises moral dilemmas, and deepens the conflict between characters, keeping the audience invested in the story.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing intense emotional moments with scientific explanations, creating a sense of urgency and tension that drives the narrative forward.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre by using proper scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions to convey the events effectively.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre by building tension, revealing important information, and advancing the plot through character interactions and dialogue.


Critique
  • The scene is emotionally charged and reveals crucial information about Plan A and Plan B, adding depth to the story.
  • The dialogue is impactful and reveals the characters' motivations and conflicts effectively.
  • There is a good balance of tension, emotion, and revelation in the scene, keeping the audience engaged.
  • The scene effectively conveys the moral dilemma faced by the characters and the sacrifices made for the greater good.
  • The interaction between Cooper, Brand, and Dr. Mann adds layers to the story and raises important ethical questions.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual elements or actions to enhance the scene and create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • Explore the emotional impact of the revelations further by delving into the characters' internal struggles and conflicting emotions.
  • Provide more context or background information to help the audience understand the significance of Plan A and Plan B.
  • Consider incorporating moments of introspection or reflection to deepen the characters' development and add complexity to their decisions.
  • Ensure that the dialogue remains authentic and consistent with the characters' personalities and motivations throughout the scene.



Scene 26 -  Search for the Missing Solution
INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DUSTY PLAIN - DAWN
Murph drives. Getty next to her. In the distance, several
fields BURN.
GETTY
Are you sure?
MURPH
His solution was correct. He’d had
it for years.

GETTY
It’s worthless?
MURPH
It’s half the answer.

GETTY
How do you find the other half?
Murph points at the sky.

MURPH
Out there? A black hole. Stuck here
on Earth? I’m not sure you can.
They pass vehicles PILED HIGH with belongings and people.
99.


GETTY
They just pack up and leave. What
are they hoping to find?
MURPH
Survival.
(Looks ahead.)
Dammit!
A DUST STORM SWAMPS the truck, killing visibility. Murph
pulls over. Kills the engine. The wind rocks the car.

GETTY
Don’t people have a right to know?
MURPH
Panic won’t help. We have to keep
working, same as ever.
GETTY
Isn’t that just what Professor
Brand ...?

MURPH
(sharp)
Brand gave up on us - I’m still
trying to solve this.
GETTY
So you have an idea?
MURPH
No. I have a ... feeling.

Getty looks at her as she STARES out at the dust.
INSERT CUT: MURPH (TEN), wet hair, towel around neck, turns
and STARES at a book on the floor -
MURPH
(V.O.)
I told you about my ghost ...
She stoops to pick up the toy next to it - a broken LUNAR
LANDER.

MURPH (FORTY) puts her hands on the glass, watching the sand
scrape the car’s window ...
MURPH
My dad thought I called it a ghost
because I was scared of it ...
100.


INSERT CUT: MURPH (TEN) counts the books and gaps.
MARVELING.
MURPH
(V.O.)
But I was never scared of it ...

MURPH (TEN) takes out her notebook and starts drawing lines
to represent the books.
MURPH
(V.O.)
I called it a ghost because it felt
like ...
MURPH (FORTY) turns to Getty.

MURPH
Like a person. Trying to tell me
something ...
The storm is clearing. Murph starts the engine.
If there’s an answer here on Earth,
it’s back there, somehow. No one’s
coming to save us.
(Pulls out.)
I have to find it ...
Murph pulls past a pickup piled with worldly goods and
people. She makes eye contact with two filthy kids in the
back ...
And we’re running out of time.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Drama"]

Summary Amidst a dusty plain, Murph and Getty confront the missing half of a solution to an impending disaster. Murph's belief in an Earthly answer prompts Getty's concern about public panic. Recalling a childhood experience, Murph suggests a toy lunar lander as a potential clue. Despite the urgency and setbacks, Murph's determination fuels their search as they navigate a dust storm and continue their relentless pursuit.
Strengths
  • Strong character development
  • Compelling theme of perseverance
  • Emotional depth
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be more concise
  • Limited interaction between characters

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively conveys the emotional weight and urgency of the characters' situation, setting up a compelling narrative for the rest of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of searching for a solution to Earth's crisis while facing skepticism and challenges is well-developed and drives the plot forward.

Plot: 8

The plot is engaging and propels the story forward, introducing key conflicts and dilemmas that will shape the characters' decisions.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the post-apocalyptic genre by focusing on the protagonist's personal journey and internal conflicts. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 7

Murph's determination and resilience shine through in this scene, while Getty serves as a contrasting voice of doubt and skepticism.

Character Changes: 7

Murph undergoes a subtle shift in her resolve, moving from determination to a deeper understanding of the challenges she faces.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to continue working towards solving a problem, despite feeling abandoned by others. This reflects her need for validation, her fear of failure, and her desire to make a difference.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to find a solution to the impending crisis and save humanity from disaster. This reflects the immediate challenge she is facing and the urgency of the situation.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between Murph's unwavering belief in finding a solution and Getty's skepticism creates tension and drives the scene forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and obstacles that challenge the protagonist's beliefs and motivations.

High Stakes: 8

The high stakes of Earth's survival and the characters' personal struggles add urgency and tension to the scene.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing key conflicts, dilemmas, and character motivations that will shape the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the protagonist's actions and the uncertain outcome of the impending crisis.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between giving up and continuing to fight for a solution. The protagonist's belief in perseverance and determination is challenged by the actions of others who have given up hope.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a strong emotional response from the audience, particularly in Murph's poignant realization of the challenges ahead.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the characters' emotions and motivations, driving the scene's tension and conflict.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense emotional stakes, sharp dialogue, and visual storytelling. The dust storm adds tension and suspense to the scene.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense, allowing for moments of introspection, and maintaining a sense of urgency.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, dialogue, and action descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with a clear setup, conflict, and resolution. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear transition from the previous scene, making it slightly disjointed in terms of flow.
  • The dialogue between Murph and Getty feels a bit on-the-nose and could benefit from more subtlety and nuance.
  • The exposition about the black hole and the solution being half-complete feels a bit forced and could be integrated more naturally into the conversation.
  • The emotional depth of the characters could be further explored to enhance the impact of their dialogue and actions.
  • The visual elements of the dust storm and the interaction between Murph and Getty could be heightened to create a more immersive experience for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a smoother transition from the previous scene to establish a stronger connection between the two.
  • Work on refining the dialogue to make it more organic and reflective of the characters' emotions and motivations.
  • Integrate the exposition about the black hole and the solution being half-complete in a more subtle and engaging manner.
  • Focus on developing the emotional depth of the characters to create a more impactful and resonant scene.
  • Enhance the visual elements of the dust storm and the interaction between Murph and Getty to create a more visually compelling and immersive scene.



Scene 27 -  Cooper's Dilemma
EXT. RANGER, DR MANN’S PLANET - DAWN
Tars is up on the wing of the Ranger. Case pilots the LANDER
in to land near the Ranger.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper is sitting with his feet on the console.
CASE
(over radio)
What about auxiliary oxygen
scrubbers?
COOPER
They can stay. I’ll sleep most of
the journey.
(Wry.)
(MORE)
101.


COOPER (cont’d)
I saw it all on the way out here.
Romilly comes through the airlock. Removes his helmet.

ROMILLY
I have a suggestion for your return
journey.
COOPER
What?

ROMILLY
Have one last crack at the black
hole ...
Tars enters.

ROMILLY
Gargantua’s an older, spinning
black hole - what we call a gentle
singularity.

COOPER
Gentle?
ROMILLY
They’re hardly gentle, but their
tidal gravity is quick enough that
something crossing the horizon fast
might survive ... a probe, say.
COOPER
What happens to it after it
crosses?
ROMILLY
Beyond the horizon is a complete
mystery - who’s to say there isn’t
some way the probe can glimpse the
singularity and relay the quantum
data? If he’s equipped to transmit
every form of energy that can pulse
- X-ray, visible light, radio -
TARS
Just when did this probe become a
’he’?
Romilly looks from Tars to Cooper, sheepish.
102.

ROMILLY
Tars is the obvious candidate. I’ve
already told him what to look for.
TARS
I’d need to take the old optical
transmitter from Kipp.
COOPER
(to Tars)
You’d do this for us?

TARS
Before you get teary, try to
remember that as a robot I have to
do anything you say, anyway.

COOPER
Your cue light’s broken.
TARS
I’m not joking.

Bing. The light flashes on.

EXT. RANGER, DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY

Brand and Dr Mann approach Cooper and Romilly at the foot of
the ladder. Cooper addresses Brand -
COOPER
Ranger’s almost ready. Case is on
his way back down with another
load.
BRAND
I’ll start a final inventory.
ROMILLY
Dr Mann, I need Tars to remove and
adapt some components from Kipp.
Dr Mann considers this. Looks at Tars. At Romilly.
DR MANN
He musn’t disturb Kipp’s archival
functions.
ROMILLY
I’ll supervise.

Dr Mann considers this. Nods.
103.

COOPER
We need to pick out a site. You
don’t wanna move the module once we
land it.
DR MANN
I’ll show you the probe sites.
Cooper glances around at the winds picking up -

COOPER
Will conditions hold?
DR MANN
These squalls usually blow over.
You’ve got a long-range
transmitter?
Cooper reaches up to check a box plugged in at his neck.
COOPER
Good to go.
Dr Mann points at a nozzle on his elbow -
DR MANN
Charged?

Cooper checks, thumbs up. Dr Mann sets off, Cooper follows.

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - LATER

As Cooper follows Dr Mann down a ridge, they see the lander
fly over. Cooper waves, reaches up to his long-range
transmitter -
COOPER
A little caution, Case?
CASE
(over radio)
Safety first, Cooper.

Cooper follows Dr Mann down to the edge of the ice. They
peer down a fifty-foot drop.
DR MANN
Just take it gently -

He steps off, DROPPING - his ELBOW JETS FIRE, slowing his
descent in time for him to land with a THUD. Cooper follows.
They set out through a massive CANYON of ice ...
104.


DR MANN
Brand told me why you feel you have
to go back -
Cooper STOPS.

COOPER
If this excursion is about trying
to change my mind, let’s turn
around right now.

DR MANN
No. I understand your position.
He turns and starts walking. Cooper follows.
DR MANN
You have attachments. I’m not
supposed to, but even without
family, I can promise you that the
yearning to be with other people is
massively powerful. Our instincts,
our emotions, are at the
foundations of what makes us human.
They’re not to be taken lightly.
The wind WHIPS ice crystals between them ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure","Drama"]

Summary Cooper and Romilly discuss sending Tars back to the black hole for quantum data. Cooper agrees after being convinced by Romilly. Dr. Mann tries to convince Cooper to stay, but Cooper insists on returning to his family. The scene ends with Cooper and Dr. Mann walking through an ice canyon, contemplating the importance of human connections and instincts.
Strengths
  • Innovative concept involving a probe and black hole data collection
  • Emotional depth and reflection in character interactions
  • High stakes and conflicts that drive the narrative forward
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly explanatory and could be streamlined for pacing

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines scientific concepts with emotional depth, creating a compelling narrative that drives the story forward.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using a probe to gather quantum data from a black hole is innovative and adds a new layer of complexity to the plot. The exploration of human emotions and attachments in the face of difficult decisions is also well-executed.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly with the introduction of the new plan involving the probe and the decision-making process regarding which planet to visit. The scene sets up important conflicts and dilemmas for the characters to navigate.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh ideas about exploring black holes and the potential for scientific discovery, while also delving into the emotional and psychological aspects of the characters' motivations and relationships. The dialogue feels authentic and engaging, adding depth to the characters' interactions.


Character Development

Characters: 7

The characters show depth and complexity in their interactions and decision-making. Their emotional struggles and conflicting motivations add depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 7

The characters undergo subtle changes in their perspectives and decisions throughout the scene, particularly in relation to the new plan involving the probe and the dilemmas they face.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to reconcile his personal attachments and emotions with the rational decision-making required for their mission. He grapples with the idea of returning to the black hole and the potential consequences of his actions on his relationships with others.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to prepare for the return journey and gather necessary resources and information for their mission. This goal reflects the immediate challenges they face in navigating the harsh environment of Dr. Mann's planet and planning for the next phase of their mission.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The scene introduces conflicts related to decision-making, scientific exploration, and personal sacrifices. The characters face internal and external conflicts that drive the narrative forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong, with conflicting viewpoints and goals among the characters that create tension and conflict. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome of the characters' decisions and actions.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in the scene, as the characters must make difficult decisions that could impact the future of humanity. The risks and sacrifices involved add tension and urgency to the narrative.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward significantly by introducing a new plan, setting up conflicts and dilemmas, and advancing the characters' journey towards their goals.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the characters' interactions and decisions, as well as the uncertain outcome of their mission. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how events will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the tension between rational decision-making based on scientific principles and the emotional attachments and instincts that drive human behavior. Dr. Mann's perspective on human emotions and attachments challenges Cooper's more rational approach to the mission.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes a sense of reflection and emotional depth, particularly in the characters' discussions about attachments and sacrifices. The stakes are high, adding to the emotional impact.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is informative and reflective, providing insight into the characters' thoughts and motivations. It effectively conveys the scientific concepts and emotional stakes of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the high stakes, tense atmosphere, and complex character dynamics that drive the narrative forward. The dialogue and actions of the characters keep the audience invested in the outcome of the mission.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense, as well as allowing for moments of reflection and character development. The rhythm of the scene keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions that enhance the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear and coherent structure, with a focus on character interactions and dialogue that drive the narrative forward. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in building tension and suspense.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency and tension, especially considering the high stakes involved in the mission.
  • The dialogue feels a bit disjointed and could be more focused on advancing the plot and revealing character motivations.
  • There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the emotional turmoil and internal conflicts of the characters, particularly Cooper and Dr. Mann.
  • The visual descriptions could be enhanced to create a more vivid and immersive setting for the audience.
  • The scene could benefit from more dynamic interactions between the characters to keep the audience engaged.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more intense and emotionally charged dialogue to heighten the drama of the scene.
  • Focus on building tension and suspense as Cooper and Dr. Mann navigate the challenges of the mission.
  • Explore the internal struggles and conflicting motivations of the characters to add depth to their interactions.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more vivid and immersive setting for the audience.
  • Introduce more dynamic action sequences or obstacles to keep the scene engaging and propel the plot forward.



Scene 28 -  The Truth Unmasked
INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - DAY
Murph introduces Getty to Lois and Coop. Getty pulls out a
STETHOSCOPE and starts examining Coop, Murph slips upstairs
...


INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - DAY
Murph opens the door. Stands in her old bedroom. Feeling ...

COOP
(O.S.)
Mama lets me play in here ...
Murph turns to see Coop. He points at a box on the shelf -
I don’t touch your stuff.
105.


EXT. LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand turns away as the lander touches down in a spray of
ice.


INT. DR MANN’S POD - CONTINUOUS
Romilly watches Tars crouch down beside Kipp and connect
Kipp to his own power. Kipp shows signs of life ...


EXT. ICE CANYON, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann waits for Cooper catch up. The WIND is picking up -
DR MANN
You know why we couldn’t just send
machines on these missions, Cooper?
COOPER
(breathless)
Frankly, no.

DR MANN
(pressing on)
A trip into the unknown requires
improvisation. Machines can’t
improvise well because you can’t
program a fear of death. The
survival instinct is our single
greatest source of inspiration.
Dr Mann pauses to take a breath. Turns to Cooper.
Take you - a father. With a
survival instinct that extends to
your kids ...
COOPER
That’s why I’m going home, hopeless
or not.

DR MANN
And what does research tell us is
the last thing you’ll see before
you die?
(Off look.)
Your children. At the very moment
of death, your mind pushes you a
little harder to survive. For them.
Dr Mann turns and starts walking out onto a massive ice
field.
106.


INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - DAY
Murph brings Coop downstairs. Getty is listening to Lois’
back. He looks up at Murph. GRAVE. Shakes his head ...
GETTY
They can’t stay here.
TOM
(O.S.)
Murph?

Murph turns to see Tom in the doorway.
What is this ...?

EXT. LANDER, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

Brand is counting flight cases when a WIND whips ice at her
...

INT. DR MANN’S POD - CONTINUOUS

Romilly takes his helmet off, PEERING over Tars’ shoulder at
Kipp’s data screen. Confused.
ROMILLY
I don’t understand.


EXT. ICE FIELD, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Cooper and Dr Mann are like two ants on a sheet.

DR MANN
The first window’s up ahead -
Cooper peers ahead to an OPENING in the ice. Dr Mann stops
at the edge. Looks around the wind-blasted ice plane.
When I left Earth I felt fully
prepared to die. But I just never
faced the possibility that my
planet wouldn’t be the one. None of
this turned out the way it was
supposed to.

COOPER
Professor Brand would disagree.
Cooper peers over the edge at an enormous CREVASSE ...

Dr Mann RIPS COOPER’S LONG-RANGE TRANSMITTER FROM HIS NECK -
107.


Cooper TURNS to Dr Mann - who BLASTS him with his ELBOW JET.
He SLIPS backwards, but avoids going over the edge -
COOPER
What are you doing?!

Until Dr Mann KICKS him. Cooper hits his jets, pushing
himself onto a lower ledge of ice -

INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - DAY

Tom confronts Murph while Getty looks on -
MURPH
They can’t stay here, Tom!

GETTY
Not one more day -
Tom TURNS, PUNCHES Getty - who collapses.
LOIS
Tom?!
TOM
Coop, get your aunt’s things -
she’s done here.

MURPH
Tom, Dad didn’t raise you this dumb
-
TOM
Dad didn’t raise us, Grandpa did,
and he’s buried outside with Mom in
our ground. I’m not leaving them -
MURPH
You have to, Tom -

TOM
I’m a farmer, Murph! You don’t give
up on the Earth.
MURPH
No! But she gave up on you! And
she’s poisoning your family.
108.


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY
Cooper SCRAMBLES to his knees. Dr Mann approaches -
DR MANN
I’m sorry - I can’t let you leave.

COOPER
Why?!
DR MANN
We’re going to need your ship to
continue the mission ... once the
others realize what this place
isn’t.
Cooper’s mind races. He looks around.

COOPER
You faked all the data?
DR MANN
I had a lot of time.

COOPER
Is there even a surface?
DR MANN
I’m afraid not -

Dr Mann KICKS Cooper over the edge, Cooper CLINGS on -
DR MANN
I tried to do my duty, Cooper, but
the day I arrived I could see this
place had nothing. I resisted the
temptation for years ... but I knew
there was a way to get rescued.
COOPER
You fucking coward.
Cooper BLASTS Dr Mann off his feet with his jet - SCRAMBLES
up onto the ice. Dr Mann TACKLES him, they go down,
WRESTLING. WIDER shows us two TINY FIGURES in a VAST
LANDSCAPE, deciding the future of humanity with a BRAWL ...
109.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Adventure"]

Summary Murph introduces Getty to her parents, Lois and Coop. However, Getty deems them unfit to stay. Tom confronts Murph, leading to a physical altercation with Getty. Meanwhile, Dr. Mann reveals his deceptive actions to Cooper and attempts to eliminate him. A fierce struggle ensues between Cooper and Mann, leaving their fates uncertain.
Strengths
  • Intense conflict
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • High stakes
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly dramatic or expository

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, combining action, emotion, and character development effectively.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring a frozen planet and the moral dilemmas faced by the characters are compelling and well-executed.

Plot: 9

The plot is driven by the intense conflict between Cooper and Dr. Mann, revealing the characters' true nature and motivations.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh ideas about survival, sacrifice, and betrayal in a futuristic setting. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters are complex and well-developed, with conflicting desires and emotions driving the action.

Character Changes: 8

Both Cooper and Dr. Mann undergo significant changes during the scene, revealing their true nature and motivations.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal is to protect her family and make difficult decisions for their well-being. This reflects her deeper need for security and stability.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to survive and complete the mission. This reflects the immediate challenges he faces in a hostile environment.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Cooper and Dr. Mann is intense and drives the scene forward, creating high stakes and emotional tension.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing physical, emotional, and moral challenges that keep the audience on edge.

High Stakes: 9

The high stakes of the scene, including the survival of the characters and the future of humanity, create intense drama and tension.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing key information about the characters and their motivations, setting up future conflicts and resolutions.

Unpredictability: 8

The scene is unpredictable due to unexpected betrayals, moral dilemmas, and dramatic confrontations.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the ethics of survival and sacrifice. Dr. Mann's actions challenge Cooper's beliefs about duty and cowardice.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the audience, particularly during the life-or-death struggle between the characters.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is tense and impactful, revealing the characters' inner thoughts and motivations.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its high stakes, intense action, and emotional conflicts between characters.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and introspective moments that maintain tension and momentum.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a sci-fi screenplay, with clear scene headings and action descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a coherent structure with clear transitions between locations and characters. It maintains tension and momentum throughout.


Critique
  • The scene transitions between multiple locations and characters quite abruptly, which can be disorienting for the audience. Consider smoother transitions to maintain clarity and flow.
  • The dialogue between Dr. Mann and Cooper feels a bit forced and expository, lacking in naturalness and depth. Try to make the conversation more authentic and engaging.
  • The conflict between Cooper and Dr. Mann escalates quickly and resolves in a physical fight, which may feel cliched and predictable. Explore more nuanced ways to resolve conflicts and add depth to the characters.
  • The emotional beats in the scene could be heightened to create a more impactful and engaging experience for the audience. Consider delving deeper into the characters' emotions and motivations.
  • The visual descriptions in the scene are vivid and engaging, but the action sequences could benefit from more detailed and dynamic imagery to enhance the tension and excitement.
Suggestions
  • Consider restructuring the scene to have a more coherent and logical progression of events, focusing on building tension and character development.
  • Work on refining the dialogue to be more natural, authentic, and reflective of the characters' personalities and relationships.
  • Explore alternative ways to resolve conflicts that add depth to the characters and elevate the emotional stakes of the scene.
  • Enhance the emotional depth of the scene by delving into the characters' internal struggles, motivations, and relationships.
  • Add more dynamic and detailed visual descriptions to the action sequences to create a more immersive and engaging cinematic experience.



Scene 29 -  Desperation and Hope on Icy Plains
INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - DAY
Murph begs Tom -
MURPH
Please, come with us.

TOM
To live underground, praying Dad
comes back to save us all?

MURPH
He’s not coming back. He was never
coming back. It’s up to us. To me.
TOM
You’re gonna save the human race,
Murph? Really? How? Our dad
couldn’t -
MURPH
HE DIDN’T EVEN TRY!
(Off look.)
He just abandoned us, Tom.
Murph looks around, frustrated. Coop hands Murph the box.
MURPH
Tom, if you won’t come, let them -

TOM
Murph.
(Points at box.)
Take your stuff, and go. Murph
hands the box back to Coop.

MURPH
Keep it.
She leaves. Getty follows.


EXT. ICE FIELD, DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY
Dr Mann LUNGES at Cooper, who SIDESTEPS him and PINS him ...

COOPER
Stop this!
Dr Mann HEADBUTTS COOPER, FACEPLATE IMPACTS FACEPLATE.
110.

COOPER
Mann! Don’t - you’ll kill us both -

CRACK. Dr Mann SMASHES his helmet into Cooper’s AGAIN AND
AGAIN as he -
DR MANN
SOMEONE’S - GLASS - WILL - GIVE -
WAY - FIRST -!

COOPER
FIFTY-FIFTY YOU KILL YOUR SELF!
STOP!
Dr Mann STOPS. Looks up at Cooper, BREATHING. Both
faceplates have TINY FRACTURES ...
DR MANN
Best odds I’ve had in years -
WHACK - He BUTTS Cooper’s faceplate, which CRACKS
SICKENINGLY. AMMONIA HISSES INSIDE - COOPER ROLLS OFF, HANDS
UP, DESPERATELY TRYING TO PLUG THE LARGE CRACK -
Dr Mann RISES. Checks the fractures in his own helmet. Bends
down to look at Cooper, STRUGGLING, CHOKING -

DR MANN
Please don’t judge me, Cooper - you
were never tested like I was. Few
men have been ...


INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DUSTY PLAIN - DAY
Murph drives. Getty looks over, sympathetic.
GETTY
You did your best, Murph.
She just stares ahead at the road ...

EXT. ICE FIELD, DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY

With curiosity and FEAR, Dr Mann watches Cooper CRAWL ...
DR MANN
You’re feeling it, aren’t you? That
survival instinct - that’s what
drove me. It’s always driven the
human race, and it’s going to save
it now. I’m going to save it. For
all mankind. For you, Cooper.
111.

Unable to watch any more, he RISES, walking away, continuing
to talk to Cooper via the radio ...

DR MANN
I’m sorry, I can’t watch you go
through this - I thought I could.
But I’m still here. I’m here for
you ...

Dr Mann, hurrying away, listens to Cooper RASPING -
DR MANN
Cooper. When you left, did
Professor Brand read you that poem?
How does it end ...?

Dr Mann hauls himself up a ledge. The wind WHIPS up ice.
DR MANN
(over radio)
’Do not go gentle ...’

Cooper FREEZES. REMEMBERS. TRANSMITTER ...
DR MANN
(over radio)
’... into that good night ...’

Cooper LOOKS around - on the ice ten feet away - the
TRANSMITTER -

INT./EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DUSTY PLAIN - DAY

Murph and Getty drive past a long line of DESPERATE REFUGEES
- glimpsing FACES hardened against insurmountable odds ...
DR MANN
(over radio)
’... Rage, rage against the dying
of the light.’

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - DAY

Cooper CRAWLS - CRAWLS - CHOKING - CRAWLING ...
Dr Mann leap/jets up onto the higher ice - glances back at
the floundering figure on the ice with pity and awe.

DR MANN
(whispers)
Cooper ...? Do you see your
children, yet?
112.

Dr Mann hears only CHOKING, GASPING, HACKING. He kills his
radio. Scared. Watches Cooper’s silent thrashing. TURNS.

Cooper GRABS the transmitter - tries to calm his FRANTIC
HANDS - can’t reconnect it with clumsy gloves - pulls glove
off - FREEZING - BITING - WAKING - he gets the connector IN
-
COOPER
BRAND! BRAND!

EXT. LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand is STARTLED by Cooper’s RASPING over her radio -

COOPER
(over radio)
HELP ... ME ... HELP ...


INT. /EXT. PICKUP TRUCK ON DUSTY PLAIN - CONTINUOUS
Murph DECIDES - she SPINS the truck around - floors it back
in the direction they came ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand JUMPS into the lander -
BRAND
Case?!

Case is already FIRING engines -
CASE
I have a fix.

BRAND
Cooper?! Cooper, we’re coming!

EXT. ICE PLAIN, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

Cooper GASPS -
COOPER
NO AIR - AMMONIA.

BRAND
(over radio)
Don’t talk - breathe as little as
possible. We’re coming -!
113.


EXT. CORNFIELDS - DAY
Murph PULLS off the road, CUTTING through the corn -

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

The lander HURTLES through the cloudscape, RECKLESSLY,
DANGEROUSLY FAST, PUNCHING through some clouds, DODGING
others -.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand watches Case fly, praying he’s not just guessing -


INT. DR MANN’S POD - CONTINUOUS
Romilly is crouched next to Tars, perturbed.
ROMILLY
This data makes no sense. Access
the archive -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Adventure"]

Summary Amidst icy desolation, Murph begs Tom to join her, but he refuses, handing her a box. Cooper grapples with Dr. Mann, who intends to kill him. Mann's hesitation allows Cooper to activate a transmitter. Murph returns just as Brand and Case fly to Cooper's aid. Romilly's doubts about data accuracy linger.
Strengths
  • Intense action
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • High stakes
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly dramatic or cliched

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotional, and action-packed, with high stakes and significant character development.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of survival in a harsh environment, betrayal, sacrifice, and moral choices is well-executed and adds depth to the story.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with a focus on survival, betrayal, and moral dilemmas that drive the action forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh elements such as the ice field setting and the characters' complex motivations. The dialogue feels authentic and drives the plot forward in unexpected ways.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters face complex challenges and make difficult decisions, leading to significant development and emotional depth.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant changes as they confront betrayal, make difficult choices, and face life-threatening situations.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal is to prove herself and take control of the situation, reflecting her need for independence and validation. She wants to save the human race and make up for her father's abandonment.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to save Cooper and prevent Dr. Mann from causing harm. This reflects the immediate challenge of survival and the need to make difficult decisions under pressure.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict is intense, with characters facing physical and moral challenges that test their limits.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing difficult choices and conflicting motivations. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of the outcome.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters fight for survival, confront betrayal, and make life-or-death decisions.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by introducing new challenges, revealing character motivations, and setting up future conflicts.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' unexpected actions and the shifting dynamics between them. The outcome is uncertain, adding to the tension.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the value of sacrifice and the survival instinct. Dr. Mann's actions challenge Cooper's beliefs about self-preservation and the greater good.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions of fear, desperation, and hope, drawing the audience into the characters' struggles.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is impactful and conveys the characters' emotions, motivations, and conflicts effectively.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, emotional depth, and fast-paced action. The characters' conflicts and decisions keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is expertly handled, with a balance of action, dialogue, and suspense. The rhythm builds tension and keeps the audience engaged throughout.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings and action descriptions. The dialogue is formatted correctly, enhancing readability.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character arcs and escalating tension. The pacing and formatting enhance the dramatic impact of the events.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clarity in terms of transitions between different locations and characters, making it confusing for the audience to follow.
  • The dialogue between Murph and Tom feels a bit forced and could be more nuanced to reflect the emotional complexity of their relationship.
  • The fight scene between Cooper and Dr. Mann could be more intense and impactful, with clearer stakes and motivations for each character.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the atmosphere and setting, especially in the ice field on Dr. Mann's planet.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth in the interactions between the characters, particularly in moments of conflict and resolution.
Suggestions
  • Consider refining the dialogue to make it more authentic and reflective of the characters' emotions and motivations.
  • Work on creating smoother transitions between different locations and characters to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Add more visual details to enhance the setting and atmosphere, especially in the ice field on Dr. Mann's planet.
  • Focus on building tension and emotional depth in the interactions between characters, particularly in moments of conflict and resolution.
  • Clarify the stakes and motivations of each character in the fight scene to make it more engaging and impactful.



Scene 30 -  Unveiling Deceit and Desperation
EXT. CORNFIELDS - DAY
Murph PULLS UP in a SCREECH of dust - jumps out - GRABS her
spare gas can, THROWING FUEL over the nearby stalks ...

EXT. ICE PLAIN, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Cooper FLOPS back onto the ice, STARING SKYWARD ...

INSERT CUT: MURPH (TEN) examines the WATCH Cooper has given
her ... She THROWS it - turns her tear-stained face to
Cooper - Cooper’s eyes water, from poison or memory -


EXT. CORNFIELDS - DAY
Murph SETS FIRE to the corn ... JUMPS in the truck -

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

The lander SWEEPS around a towering cumulus, SPIRALING in on
the ICE PLAIN -
114.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand POINTS -
BRAND
I see him -


EXT. FARMHOUSE - DAY
Tom RACES out of the house, JUMPS in Cooper’s old truck,
heading out to the fire ... calling on the radio -

EXT. ICE PLAIN, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Through WATERING EYES and WIND-WHIPPED ICE, Cooper glimpses
Brand LEAPING from the lander, elbow jets firing. Brand RIPS
Cooper’s helmet off - THRUSTS an OXYGEN MASK over his nose
and mouth. Cooper GASPS, SUCKING AIR HARD -
COOPER
MANN - WAS - MANN -

BRAND
Dr Mann did this?!
Cooper nods. Brand takes this in - REALIZES -
Romilly!

She keys her long-range transmitter -
Romilly?! Romilly?!

INT. DR MANN’S POD - CONTINUOUS

Tars turns back from Kipp.
TARS
It needs a person to unlock its
archival function.

Tars makes way for Romilly, who leans in to the screen. He
glances at his helmet - the radio is SQUAWKING. As he
reaches for his helmet, he places his hand on the screen -
Kipp FLICKERS TO LIFE ... Romilly lifts his helmet -

ROMILLY
Brand -?
Kipp LOOKS UP -
115.


KIPP
Please, don’t make -
And EXPLODES -


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann hears the explosion - sees a BLACK CLOUD rising from
up the hill. PANIC-STRICKEN -

DR MANN
Dammit, Romilly ...
He switches his radio back on -
BRAND
(over radio)
Come on, Cooper! Couple more steps
-
Dr Mann THINKS - makes for the Ranger.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand pulls the mask off Cooper, who looks at Case -
COOPER
What happened to caution?
CASE
Safety first.
COOPER
Brand, I’m sorry. We should’ve
followed your instincts. Mann lied
about this place -
BRAND
(scared)
Oh, no -

EXT. FARMHOUSE - DAY

Murph SCREECHES up - turns to Getty -
MURPH
Keep watch -
She runs towards the farmhouse.
Lois!
116.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - DAY
Case spots something on the console.
CASE
There’s been an explosion -

BRAND
Where?
CASE
Dr Mann’s compound.
Case puts the lander into the air.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

Dr Mann straps in. Powers up.

EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

The Ranger RISES -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann pushes the craft into the air -


EXT. DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The lander comes through the black smoke from Dr Mann’s pod.

Below - a figure BURSTS out of the smoke: Tars, blackened,
burned, but RUNNING ... towards the lander -

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Case SWINGS the lander around and HITS the airlock open -

EXT. DR MANN’S POD - CONTINUOUS
Tars LEAPS UP into the airlock - the lander THRUSTS away -
117.


INT. COCKPIT, THE LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks over at Case -
COOPER
Do you have a fix on the Ranger?

CASE
He’s pushing into orbit -
COOPER
If he takes control of the ship
we’re dead -
BRAND
He’d maroon us?

COOPER
He is marooning us -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action","Drama"]

Summary Murph ignites a cornfield to fulfill her mission. On Dr. Mann's planet, Brand rescues Cooper, exposing Mann's treachery. Meanwhile, at the farmhouse, Murph alerts her family to the blaze.
Strengths
  • Intense conflict
  • Emotional depth
  • Revealing plot twist
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be slightly cliched or predictable

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotional, and pivotal to the plot, with high stakes and strong character dynamics.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of betrayal and deception leading to a life-threatening situation is well-executed and adds depth to the story.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with a major revelation that propels the story forward and raises the stakes for the characters.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique elements such as the betrayal of Dr. Mann and the explosive confrontation, adding fresh twists to the narrative. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and drive the plot forward.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' reactions to the betrayal and their emotional turmoil are well-developed and drive the conflict in the scene.

Character Changes: 8

The characters undergo significant emotional changes as they grapple with the betrayal and its consequences.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to confront the betrayal of Dr. Mann and the consequences of his lies. This reflects the protagonist's need for truth and justice.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to survive and escape the dangerous situation on Dr. Mann's planet. This reflects the immediate challenge they are facing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and multi-layered, with betrayal, deception, and survival at the forefront.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with characters facing difficult challenges and uncertain outcomes that add tension and suspense.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters face betrayal, deception, and a life-threatening situation.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing a major plot twist and setting up new challenges for the characters.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists and turns in the plot, keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between honesty and deception. The protagonist must navigate the consequences of Dr. Mann's lies and decide how to proceed with the truth.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the characters and the audience, particularly through the themes of betrayal and sacrifice.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension, emotions, and conflict between the characters.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, intense action, and emotional conflicts that keep the audience invested in the characters' fates.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is fast-paced and dynamic, with quick cuts between different locations and intense action sequences that maintain the audience's interest.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with concise descriptions and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for its genre, with clear scene transitions and character actions driving the plot forward.


Critique
  • The scene transitions abruptly from Murph setting fire to the cornfields to Cooper flopping back onto the ice on Dr. Mann's planet, which can be disorienting for the audience.
  • There is a lack of clarity in the dialogue and actions of the characters, making it difficult to follow the sequence of events and understand the urgency of the situation.
  • The scene lacks emotional depth and fails to fully capture the gravity of the situation, such as Dr. Mann's deception and the explosion at his compound.
  • The visual descriptions are sparse and do not effectively convey the intensity of the action and the emotions of the characters.
  • The pacing of the scene feels rushed, with quick cuts between different locations and events, making it challenging for the audience to fully engage with the unfolding drama.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more context and transitions between the different locations to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Clarify the dialogue and actions of the characters to ensure that the audience can easily follow the sequence of events and understand the stakes involved.
  • Enhance the emotional impact of the scene by delving deeper into the characters' motivations and reactions to the unfolding events.
  • Provide more vivid and descriptive visual imagery to create a more immersive experience for the audience.
  • Adjust the pacing of the scene to allow for moments of tension and suspense to build, creating a more engaging and impactful narrative.



Scene 31 -  Approaching Endurance
INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - DAY

Lois and Coop head outside with a few essentials. Murph
heads upstairs ...

EXT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS

Getty helps them into the truck, glances nervously at the
distant fire -
GETTY
Come on, Murph!


EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger ROCKETS upwards ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper moves up next to Case. Hits the transmitter -
COOPER
Dr Mann? Dr Mann, please respond -
CASE
He doesn’t know the Endurance
docking procedure.
118.


COOPER
The autopilot does.
CASE
Not since Tars disabled it.

Cooper looks into the airlock -
COOPER
Nice. What’s your trust setting?

TARS
Lower than yours, apparently.
Cooper hits the transmitter -
COOPER
Dr Mann?

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann hears Cooper. Ignores him - looking instead at the
navigation computer.
COOPER
(over radio)
Dr Mann, if you attempt docking -

Dr Mann switches off the transmitter -

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - DAY
Murph looks at the bookshelves. Spots the box. Moves over to
it and LOOKS INSIDE ...

EXT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
Outside, Getty paces, Lois and Coop sit tight ...


EXT. ORBIT, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger approaches the Endurance ...
119.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann pilots the lander alongside the ship. Hits the
autopilot -
COMPUTER VOICE
Auto-docking sequence withheld.
Dr Mann looks at the screen, surprised.
DR MANN
Override.
COMPUTER VOICE
Unauthorized.
Dr Mann thinks. Looks over at the MANUAL DOCKING CONTROLS
...

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper peers ahead as they SHOOT up into orbit. Brand looks
- the Ranger is in close to the Endurance -
COOPER
Dr Mann, do not attempt docking. Dr
Mann?

Static.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann SCRAMBLES from the controls to the airlock, FOCUSED
...

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The Ranger inches closer to an OUTER HATCH of Endurance - A
ROW OF MECHANICAL GRAPPLES tries to connect with Endurance -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann works the docking system, concentrating -
120.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The grapples PULL the Ranger into the Endurance hatch.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

A CLANG as the ships come together -
COMPUTER VOICE
Imperfect contact - hatch lockout.

DR MANN
Override.
COMPUTER VOICE
Hatch lockout disengaged.

Dr Mann moves to the airlock control ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Adventure"]

Summary The Ranger rockets upwards to dock with the Endurance in orbit. Cooper and Case are in the lander, while Dr. Mann attempts to dock the Ranger manually, despite facing challenges with the autopilot and docking procedure. Murph discovers a box in her bedroom, while Getty remains outside, anxious about the distant fire. Despite Dr. Mann's attempts to override the computer and engage the mechanical grapples, the Ranger encounters imperfect contact and a hatch lockout, which Dr. Mann also overrides.
Strengths
  • Intense conflict
  • Emotional depth
  • Revealing character moments
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly expository
  • Certain plot points may feel contrived

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, emotional depth, and significant plot developments. It keeps the audience on the edge of their seats and sets the stage for the climax of the story.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of sacrifice, deception, and the survival of humanity are central themes in this scene. The revelation about Plan A and Plan B adds complexity to the narrative and raises moral dilemmas for the characters.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with key revelations about the characters' motivations and the true nature of their mission. The conflict between Cooper and Dr. Mann escalates, leading to a critical turning point in the story.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces a fresh take on space exploration by combining rural and futuristic settings, highlighting the importance of trust and teamwork in a high-stakes mission. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the overall tension of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' depth and complexity shine in this scene, especially in their interactions and emotional responses to the unfolding events. Cooper's determination, Brand's loyalty, and Dr. Mann's deception add layers to their personalities.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters undergo significant changes in this scene, particularly in their beliefs, motivations, and relationships. The revelations about Plan A and Plan B force them to reevaluate their choices and priorities.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to ensure the safety of his crew and complete the mission successfully. This reflects his desire to protect his loved ones and fulfill his responsibilities as a leader.

External Goal: 7.5

Cooper's external goal is to prevent Dr. Mann from attempting a dangerous docking procedure that could jeopardize the mission. This goal reflects the immediate challenge he faces in space.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Cooper and Dr. Mann reaches a peak in this scene, leading to a dramatic confrontation that tests their loyalties and values. The high stakes and intense emotions drive the tension throughout.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Dr. Mann's actions creating a sense of conflict and uncertainty that drives the plot forward.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are incredibly high in this scene, as the characters must confront betrayal, deception, and the survival of humanity. The choices they make will have far-reaching consequences and determine the fate of both Earth and the space mission.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing crucial information, escalating the conflict, and setting up the climax of the narrative. It introduces new challenges and dilemmas that will shape the characters' decisions and the outcome of their mission.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions of Dr. Mann and the tense atmosphere created by the impending danger.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the importance of trust and teamwork. Cooper's trust in his crew members and their ability to work together is tested by Dr. Mann's actions, highlighting the value of collaboration and communication.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the audience, as the characters face difficult choices and revelations that impact their relationships and the fate of humanity. The emotional depth adds resonance to the narrative.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is impactful and reveals the characters' inner thoughts and conflicts. It drives the emotional intensity of the scene and conveys the high stakes involved in the characters' decisions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its fast-paced action, high-stakes conflict, and suspenseful dialogue that keeps the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 8.5

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a sense of urgency and tension, keeping the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene descriptions and character actions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows the expected structure for a sci-fi genre, with a mix of dialogue and action sequences that build tension and advance the plot.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clear transitions between the different locations, making it feel disjointed.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Case feels a bit forced and could be more natural.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth in the interactions between the characters, especially considering the high stakes and tension of the situation.
  • The action sequences could be more descriptive and engaging to create a sense of urgency and suspense.
  • The visual elements could be enhanced to create a more vivid and immersive setting for the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding smoother transitions between the different locations to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Work on refining the dialogue to make it more authentic and reflective of the characters' emotions and motivations.
  • Focus on building the emotional intensity of the scene to create a stronger connection with the audience.
  • Enhance the action sequences by adding more detail and descriptive language to heighten the tension and excitement.
  • Pay attention to the visual elements to create a more vivid and immersive setting that complements the action and dialogue.



Scene 32 -  Confrontation in Space
INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper stares out at the Ranger -
COOPER
Is he locked on?
CASE
Imperfectly.
Cooper grabs the transmitter -
COOPER
Dr Mann! Dr Mann! Do not, repeat do
not attempt to open the hatch! If
you -

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS

In SILENCE Dr Mann looks through the hatch window. Hits the
button opening the outer door -

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

The outer door of the Ranger SLIDES OPEN. Several grapples
are OPENING AND CLOSING BLINDLY, trying to seal the join -
121.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks at Case -
COOPER
What happens if he blows the hatch?

CASE
Nothing good.
COOPER
Pull us back!
Case hits the retro-thrusters.
BRAND
Case, relay my transmission to his
onboard computer, and have it
rebroadcast as emergency p.a. -
BRAND
(hits transmitter)
DR MANN, DO NOT OPEN THE IN--


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Silence. Dr Mann takes a breath, reaches for the inner lever
-

BRAND
(over radio)
--PEAT - DO NOT OPEN INNER HATCH!
Dr Mann is STARTLED by the voice. He hits the transmitter -

DR MANN
Brand, I don’t know what Cooper’s
told you, but I’m taking control of
the Endurance, then we’ll talk
about continuing the mission. This
is not my survival, or Cooper’s -
this is mankind’s -
Turns back to the lever ... PULLS IT -

A DEVASTATING RUSH OF AIR YANKS HIM INTO THE AIRLOCK -
122.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The ESCAPING AIR AND DEBRIS push Endurance into a slow SPIN
...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER - CONTINUOUS
Dr Mann is HAMMERED by debris as the airlock starts to RIP
APART -


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The ship SPINS FASTER AND FASTER - the Ranger is RIPPED
AWAY, FRAGMENTING, SHREDDING THE CLOSEST MODULE OF THE RING.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
They STARE in HORROR as their ship is sent SPINNING OFF ITS
ORBIT TOWARDS THE PLANET -

BRAND
Oh, my God.
Cooper GRABS the sticks - HITS the thrusters -


EXT. ORBIT, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The CRIPPLED Endurance is in a FAST FLAT SPIN, heading down
towards the stratosphere -
The lander FLIES after it, DODGING the Ranger debris -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Thriller"]

Summary Cooper and Case attempt to stop Dr. Mann from opening the Ranger's hatch, leading to a catastrophic sequence of events. Dr. Mann is sucked into the airlock, causing the Ranger to be destroyed and the Endurance to spin out of control. Cooper takes the controls of the lander to pursue the Endurance.
Strengths
  • Intense atmosphere
  • Emotional depth
  • High stakes
  • Character development
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be overly dramatic or exposition-heavy

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotionally charged, and pivotal to the plot, with high stakes and significant character development.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of sacrifice, betrayal, and moral dilemmas is effectively portrayed, adding depth to the story and raising thought-provoking questions.

Plot: 9

The plot advances significantly with the revelation of Dr. Mann's deception and the resulting dangerous situation, keeping the audience engaged and eager to see the resolution.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh take on the space survival genre with its intense action and moral conflict. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the authenticity of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' motivations, conflicts, and relationships are well-developed, especially with the betrayal by Dr. Mann leading to intense emotional reactions and character growth.

Character Changes: 8

Several characters experience significant changes due to the betrayal and the life-threatening situation, leading to growth and development.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to prevent Dr. Mann from endangering the mission and the crew's survival. This reflects his desire to protect his team and fulfill his responsibilities as a leader.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to prevent Dr. Mann from opening the hatch and causing catastrophic damage to the spacecraft. This goal is directly related to the immediate challenge of saving the crew and the mission.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict reaches a peak with Dr. Mann's betrayal and the life-threatening situation, creating intense drama and suspense.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Dr. Mann's actions creating a significant obstacle for the protagonist and adding to the uncertainty of the outcome.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are extremely high, with the characters' lives in danger due to Dr. Mann's betrayal and the life-threatening situation they find themselves in.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by revealing crucial information, escalating the conflict, and setting the stage for the climax.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected actions of Dr. Mann and the escalating danger faced by the characters.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene is between Dr. Mann's selfish desire for control and the greater good of mankind. This challenges Cooper's belief in teamwork and sacrifice for the greater good.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes fear, shock, and desperation in the characters and the audience, leading to a powerful emotional impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the tension, urgency, and emotional turmoil of the characters, enhancing the dramatic impact of the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, intense action, and moral dilemmas that keep the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and suspense, with a fast-paced rhythm that keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, dialogue, and action descriptions.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a high-stakes action sequence in a sci-fi setting, with clear pacing and escalating tension.


Critique
  • The scene is filled with tension and suspense, which is effective in keeping the audience engaged.
  • The dialogue and actions of the characters effectively convey the urgency and high stakes of the situation.
  • The visual descriptions help create a vivid picture of the chaotic and dangerous events unfolding in the scene.
  • The conflict between Cooper, Case, Brand, and Dr. Mann is well-established and drives the action forward.
  • The scene effectively sets up a climactic moment with the Ranger being ripped away and the Endurance spinning out of control.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more internal thoughts or emotions for the characters to deepen the audience's connection with them.
  • Provide more context or backstory to enhance the impact of the conflict between the characters.
  • Explore the aftermath of the events in the scene to show the consequences of the actions taken.
  • Consider adding a moment of reflection or introspection for the characters to add depth to their motivations.
  • Ensure that the resolution of the conflict is satisfying and ties up any loose ends from the scene.



Scene 33 -  Docking with the Endurance
INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper’s eyes are glued to the Endurance as he flies -

CASE
Cooper, there’s no point using our
fuel to -
COOPER
Just analyze the Endurance’s spin -

BRAND
What’re you doing?!
123.


COOPER
Docking.

EXT. ORBIT, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS

The DIZZYING SPIN of the Endurance as it PLUMMETS towards
the ATMOSPHERE - The lander ROCKETS after it, CLOSING SLOWLY
-


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper pours on the power -
CASE
Endurance rotation is 67, 68 RPM -

COOPER
Get ready to match it on the
retro-thrusters -
CASE
It’s not possible -
COOPER
No. It’s necessary.


EXT. ORBIT, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The SPINNING ENDURANCE starts to encounter the STRATOSPHERE
- heating up -


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Brand looks ahead at the spinning ship -
CASE
Endurance is hitting stratosphere -
BRAND
She’s got no heat shield -!
Cooper checks the lander’s speed against Endurance - pulls
back on thrust as they come in below it -
124.

EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The lander is PERILOUSLY CLOSE to the RED HOT UNDERSIDE of
the SPINNING ENDURANCE. The lander BANKS sideways, bringing
its airlock within FEET of the spinning Endurance -

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper looks sideways at the spinning hull -
COOPER
Case, you ready?
CASE
Ready.
Cooper watches the spinning hull, suddenly UNCERTAIN -
CASE
Cooper?
(Off look.)
This is no time for caution.
COOPER
(grins)
If I black out, take the stick -
Tars, get ready to engage the
docking mechanism - Brand, hold
tight -
CASE
Endurance is starting to heat -
COOPER
HIT IT!
Case hits the RETRO-THRUSTERS. The view SPINS -


EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The lander goes into a FASTER AND FASTER SPIN as it, with
Endurance, PLUMMETS towards the planet -


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
LIGHT FLASHES across their faces as the G-force of the spin
PULLS THEM AGAINST THEIR RESTRAINTS. Cooper STRUGGLES to
stay conscious - they BUFFET AGAINST THE ATMOSPHERE -
Tars opens the airlock - the Endurance hatch above him is
now SLOWLY ROTATING relative to him ...
125.

EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The GLOWING HOT Endurance and the lander PLUMMET, SPINNING
towards the ice planet, whose curvature is FAST DISAPPEARING
-

INT. AIRLOCK, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Tars peers up as THE SPIN SPEEDS MATCH. He waits as the
BUFFETING moves the hatches ... THEY LINE UP - he FIRES the
GRAPPLES - they don’t connect - the hatches moved -

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Brand loses consciousness - Cooper watches the instruments,
not the dizzying view, on the point of RED OUT -
COOPER
Come on, Tars ... come on ...


INT. AIRLOCK, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Tars sees the hatches roll back into ALIGNMENT. He FIRES
AGAIN - this time THE GRAPPLES HOLD -

TARS
GOT IT!

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper registers this. Case fires the retro-rockets to slow
the spin.
COOPER
Gen-- gentle, Case ...

EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The two craft, NOW JOINED, start to spin more SLOWLY ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper eases back into his seat as the G-force lessens -

COOPER
Get ready to pull us up -
The spin is slowing to almost nothing -
126.


EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
Parts are RIPPING off the Endurance in the HEAT -

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Cooper EASES into POWER on the main thrusters -
COOPER
Come on. You can do it ...


EXT. STRATOSPHERE, DR MANN’S PLANET - CONTINUOUS
The THRUSTERS on the lander start to DRAG both ships back up
away from the planet, the heat DIMINISHING -


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Cooper pulls back on the sticks, RELIEF washing over him.
Brand comes to ... Cooper turns to Case, grinning -

COOPER
Right? And for our next trick ...
CASE
It’ll have to be good. We’re
heading into Gargantua’s pull -
Cooper’s smile fades. He UNBUCKLES -
COOPER
Take her -


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - MOMENTS LATER
HISSING STEAM - RUSHING AIR - WHIRLING DEBRIS as Tars and
Cooper (in suit and helmet) lock down different BULKHEADS -

Brand (in suit and helmet) FLOATS alongside the POPULATION
BOMB, checking the equipment -
CASE
(over radio)
Cooper, we’re slipping towards
Gargantua - shall I use main
engines?
127.


COOPER
No! Let her slide as long as we can
-
Cooper FLIES over to Tars, who is welding a bulkhead -

COOPER
Give it to me.
TARS
There’s good news and bad news -

COOPER
I’ve heard that one, Tars - just
give it to me straight.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action","Drama"]

Summary Cooper pilots the lander towards the spinning Endurance, assisted by Case, Brand, and Tars. Despite concerns and risks, Cooper remains determined to dock. Tars connects the two crafts as they enter the planet's atmosphere, facing intense heat and debris. Cooper's skilled maneuvering slows their spin and pulls them back up. The team works to secure the ships as they prepare to enter Gargantua's gravitational field.
Strengths
  • Intense action
  • High stakes
  • Strong character dynamics
  • Emotional resonance
Weaknesses
  • Some moments of confusion in the action sequence
  • Limited character development

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, filled with tension, and showcases the characters' bravery and quick thinking in a life-threatening situation.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a daring rescue mission in space is executed with high stakes and urgency, keeping the audience on the edge of their seats.

Plot: 9

The plot is driven by the urgent need to save the crew of the Endurance, leading to a thrilling and suspenseful sequence of events.

Originality: 9

The scene is original in its depiction of a high-stakes space docking maneuver, showcasing the characters' resourcefulness and determination in the face of danger. The dialogue feels authentic and the actions of the characters are believable within the context of the story.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show bravery, determination, and teamwork in the face of danger, adding depth to the scene and highlighting their heroic qualities.

Character Changes: 7

Cooper demonstrates his leadership and quick thinking skills, while Brand shows her resilience and determination in the face of danger.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal is to successfully dock with the spinning Endurance ship, showcasing his determination, problem-solving skills, and willingness to take risks for the greater good.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to save the crew and complete the mission by successfully docking with the Endurance ship despite the dangerous circumstances.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and life-threatening, as the characters face the challenge of docking the lander with the spinning Endurance to save the crew.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing multiple obstacles and challenges as they attempt to dock with the spinning ship. The uncertainty of the outcome adds to the tension and suspense.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are incredibly high in the scene, as the characters must successfully dock the lander with the spinning Endurance to save the crew from certain disaster.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by resolving the immediate crisis of saving the crew and setting up new challenges and developments for the characters.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' unexpected decisions and the constantly shifting circumstances they face. The audience is kept guessing about the outcome until the last moment.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the idea of taking risks and pushing boundaries to achieve a goal, even when faced with seemingly impossible odds. Cooper's willingness to go beyond what is considered safe challenges the traditional notions of caution and calculated risk-taking.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 8

The scene evokes a strong emotional response from the audience, as they root for the characters to succeed in their daring rescue mission.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is fast-paced, urgent, and focused on the mission at hand, effectively conveying the tension and high stakes of the situation.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, fast-paced action, and the characters' quick thinking under pressure. The audience is kept on the edge of their seat as they root for the characters to succeed.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is fast and intense, mirroring the urgency of the characters' situation. The rhythm of the action sequences and dialogue keeps the audience engaged and invested in the outcome.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with concise descriptions and dialogue cues that enhance the reader's understanding of the action.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a high-tension action sequence, with a clear setup, rising action, and resolution. The pacing and formatting contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene is filled with intense action and high stakes, which creates a sense of urgency and suspense. However, the pacing of the scene could be improved to allow for more clarity and tension to build up.
  • There are moments where the dialogue feels a bit rushed and could benefit from more depth and emotional impact, especially given the gravity of the situation.
  • The visual elements are vivid and engaging, but there could be more focus on the characters' reactions and emotions to enhance the audience's connection to the scene.
  • The conflict between Cooper, Case, and Brand is well-established, but there could be more exploration of their individual motivations and fears in the face of such a dangerous situation.
  • The resolution of the conflict is somewhat abrupt, and there could be more development in terms of the characters' growth and decision-making process.
Suggestions
  • Consider slowing down the pacing of the scene to allow for more tension and emotional depth to be conveyed.
  • Enhance the dialogue to reflect the characters' internal struggles and fears, adding more layers to their interactions.
  • Focus on the characters' reactions and emotions to create a stronger connection with the audience and heighten the impact of the scene.
  • Further explore the characters' motivations and fears to add complexity and depth to the conflict and resolution.
  • Develop the resolution of the conflict to show the characters' growth and decision-making process more clearly, providing a satisfying conclusion to the scene.



Scene 34 -  Sacrifice and Survival
INT. SAME - MOMENTS LATER
Cooper SCRAMBLES to where Brand is checking her equipment.
COOPER
The navigation mainframe’s
destroyed and we don’t have enough
life support to make it back to
Earth. But we might scrape to
Edmunds’ planet.
BRAND
What about fuel?
COOPER
Not enough. But I’ve got a plan -
let Gargantua suck us right to her
horizon - then a powered slingshot
around to launch us at Edmunds.
BRAND
Manually?

COOPER
That’s what I’m here for. I’ll take
us just inside the critical orbit.
BRAND
And the time slippage?

COOPER
Neither of us can afford to worry
about relativity right now.
128.


BRAND
I’m sorry, Cooper.
They embrace, delicately touching faceplate to faceplate.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The CRIPPLED Endurance FALLS towards the HEART OF DARKNESS
among the stars ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - DAY
Cooper looks ahead at Gargantua. Preparing for battle.


EXT. ENDURANCE - MOMENTS LATER
The lander DETACHES, shifting its orientation ...
COOPER
(over radio)
Once we’ve gathered enough speed
around Gargantua - we use the
lander 1 Ranger 2 as
rocket-boosters to push us out of
the black hole’s gravity ...

The lander REATTACHES to the rear of the ring module.

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper slides into Ranger 2 - checking the systems.

COOPER
The linkages between landers are
destroyed ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Tars sits at the controls, running similar checks ...
COOPER
(over radio)
So we’ll control manually. When
Lander 1’s spent, Tars will detach
...
129.


TARS
And get sucked into that black
hole.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand and Case listen to Cooper and Tars over the radio.
BRAND
Why does he have to detach?

COOPER
(over radio)
We have to shed mass if we’re gonna
escape that gravity.

TARS
(over radio)
Newton’s third law - the only way
humans have ever figured out of
getting somewhere is to leave
something behind.

BRAND
Cooper, you can’t ask Tars to do
this for us -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure"]

Summary Cooper informs Brand about the destroyed navigation mainframe and limited life support, but proposes a risky plan to reach Edmunds' planet using Gargantua's gravity. Amidst concerns about fuel and time slippage, Cooper insists on a decisive action. Tars volunteers to sacrifice himself by detaching and being sucked into the black hole to reduce mass and enable their escape. Despite Brand's reluctance, Cooper convinces her of its necessity. With the lander prepared for the slingshot maneuver, Cooper and Tars embark on a perilous journey as the Endurance falls towards Gargantua.
Strengths
  • High stakes
  • Emotional depth
  • Tension
  • Innovative concept
Weaknesses
  • Limited character interaction
  • Technical dialogue focus

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotional, and pivotal to the plot, with high stakes and character development.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using a black hole's gravity as a slingshot is innovative and adds a unique twist to the space travel narrative. The idea of shedding mass to escape gravity is also well-executed.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with a clear goal and obstacles for the characters to overcome. The tension and urgency drive the scene forward.

Originality: 8

The scene presents a fresh approach to the space survival genre, with unique challenges and solutions that keep the audience engaged. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and contribute to the tension of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show determination, sacrifice, and emotional depth in this scene. Their decisions and actions drive the plot forward.

Character Changes: 7

The characters show growth and determination in the face of adversity, especially Cooper taking charge of the situation and making difficult decisions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to ensure the survival of themselves and their crew members. This reflects their deeper need for connection, loyalty, and sacrifice for the greater good.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to navigate through a black hole and reach Edmunds' planet for potential survival. This goal reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges they are facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the characters' desperate situation and their determination to survive creates tension and drives the scene forward.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with difficult challenges and obstacles that the characters must overcome, adding to the suspense and uncertainty of the outcome.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are incredibly high, with the characters risking everything to reach their goal and survive in a dangerous environment.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, setting up a crucial turning point in the characters' journey and the overall plot.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected challenges and solutions the characters face, keeping the audience guessing about the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the theme of sacrifice and the laws of physics. The characters must make difficult decisions and leave things behind in order to move forward, challenging their beliefs about survival and sacrifice.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The emotional impact is high, with the characters facing difficult choices and sacrificing for the greater good. The scene evokes a sense of desperation and hope.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is focused on the technical aspects of the plan, conveying urgency and determination. It could benefit from more emotional depth and character interaction.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, intense dialogue, and technical details that keep the audience on the edge of their seats.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of action, dialogue, and tension that keeps the audience engaged and invested in the characters' journey.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for a screenplay, with clear scene headings, dialogue, and action descriptions.

Structure: 9

The scene follows the expected structure for a high-stakes action sequence in a sci-fi genre, with clear progression and development of the plot.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear sense of urgency and tension considering the gravity of the situation. The dialogue feels somewhat flat and could be more impactful to convey the high stakes involved.
  • The emotional depth of the characters could be further explored, especially in a moment where they are facing a life-threatening situation. More emphasis on the emotional connection between Cooper and Brand could enhance the scene.
  • The technical details of the plan to use Gargantua's gravity for a slingshot maneuver could be explained more clearly to ensure the audience understands the complexity of the plan.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to create a vivid picture of the intense action and danger the characters are facing as they approach Gargantua.
  • The interaction between Cooper, Brand, and Tars could be more dynamic and engaging to capture the tension and teamwork required in such a critical moment.
Suggestions
  • Enhance the dialogue to convey the urgency and high stakes of the situation. Consider adding more emotional depth to the interactions between the characters.
  • Clarify the technical details of the plan in a way that is easily understandable for the audience.
  • Include more visual descriptions to create a vivid and immersive scene that conveys the intensity of the action.
  • Focus on the teamwork and dynamics between the characters to highlight the collaboration and tension in the critical moment.
  • Consider adding a sense of impending danger and suspense to heighten the dramatic impact of the scene.



Scene 35 -  Cooper's Detachment
INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper puts his hands on the controls -
COOPER
He’s a robot, Amelia - I don’t have
to ask him to do anything.

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Brand is furious -
BRAND
Cooper, you asshole -
COOPER
(over radio)
Sorry, you broke up a little there.
TARS
(over radio)
It’s what we intended, Dr Brand ...
130.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Tars sits at the controls, ready.
TARS
It’s our last chance to save people
on Earth - if I can find some way
to transmit the quantum data I’ll
find in there, they might still
make it.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand considers this.
BRAND
If there’s someone still there to
receive it ...

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

The Endurance ACCELERATES towards the darkness ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The black hole’s gravity makes the ship SHUDDER ... Brand,
helmet on, tightens her harness ...

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The Endurance STREAKS above the glowing horizon, SKIRTING
the BLACKNESS beneath ...

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Tars looks out at the DARK OCEAN ...


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The ship orbits the black hole with BLINDING ACCELERATION -
131.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The ship is SHAKING with GRAVITATIONAL ENERGY ...
CASE
MAXIMUM VELOCITY ACHIEVED ...
PREPARE TO FIRE ESCAPE THRUSTERS -

INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS

Tars checks his instruments -
TARS
Ready.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper checks his instruments -
COOPER
Ready.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand looks out at the glowing horizon. Glances fearfully at
the darkness below ... Case puts his hand on the button -

CASE
Main engine ignition in three, two,
one, mark -
Case hits the button -


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
The MAIN ENGINES FIRE - STRAINING AGAINST GARGANTUA ...


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand feels the thrusters STRAIN to lift the craft -
CASE
Lander 1 engines, on my mark,
three, two, one, mark -
132.


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER - CONTINUOUS
Tars hits the button -
TARS
Fire.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Lander 1’s engines FIRE, adding to the thrust. The Endurance
starts RISING away from the darkness ...
CASE
(over radio)
Ranger 2’s engines, on my mark -
three, two, one, mark -


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper hits the button -

COOPER
Fire.

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Ranger 2’s engines add a fresh BLAST of fire, pushing the
Endurance higher and higher ... back into the starlight ...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS

Cooper, shaking with the thrust, looks at his instruments -
COOPER
That little maneuver cost us
fifty-one years ...!


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand holds on tight -
BRAND
You don’t sound so bad for a
hundred and twenty!
133.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Lander 1’s engines DIE OUT ...
CASE
(over radio)
Lander 1, prepare to detach, on my
mark ... three ...

INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Brand looks over at the lander -
CASE
Two ...


INT. COCKPIT, LANDER 1 - CONTINUOUS
CASE
(over radio)
One ... mark -

Tars hits a switch -
TARS
Detach.


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand sees Lander 1 DROP, revealing Cooper in Ranger 2 ...
BRAND
Goodbye, Tars ...
TARS
(over radio)
See you on the other side, Coop ...


Something in this makes Brand frown, PUZZLED ...

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Lander 1 FALLS behind as the Endurance continues to RISE ...
134.


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper checks his dwindling fuel supply ...
COOPER
Hey, Case? Nice reckless flying.

CASE
(over radio)
Learned from the master.


EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
As Lander 1 FALLS back towards Gargantua, Ranger 2’s engines
DIE OUT ...


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Case registers the burnout.
CASE
Ranger 2, prepare to detach -
Brand looks up, SHOCKED -
BRAND
NO!

She UNBUCKLES -
CASE
On my mark -

FLIES to the window looking onto Cooper -
BRAND
What are you doing!
CASE
Three ...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks across at Brand.

COOPER
Newton’s third law - you have to
leave something behind.
135.


CASE
(over radio)
Two ...


INT. RING MODULE, ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand pushes her helmet up against the window,
BRAND
You told me we had enough power -

CASE
One ...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS

Cooper looks at her, fondly -
COOPER
Hey, we agreed - ninety percent.

CASE
(over radio)
Mark ...
Cooper reaches for the button. Takes one last look at Brand
- inside her helmet, Brand is crying, zero-G tears catching
in her eyelashes like melted snowflakes.
Cooper hits the button. But the word catches in his throat
-.
COOPER
Detach -

EXT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS

Ranger 2 DROPS AWAY from the Endurance ...

INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper sees the Endurance ACCELERATE AWAY to a bright point
as he FALLS AND FALLS ... Cooper starts to breathe FASTER -
136.


EXT. GARGANTUA - CONTINUOUS
Ranger 2 PLUMMETS towards blackness as the horizon GLOWS
BRIGHTER and BRIGHTER - distorted starlight, plasma jets ...


INT. COCKPIT, RANGER 2 - CONTINUOUS
Cooper, trying to control his breathing, uses retro-rockets
to TURN the lander down. He GASPS at the FLAMING HORIZON -

COOPER
(over radio)
Tars? Are you there?
STATIC - Ranger 2 TILTS down - INKY BLACKNESS ahead -


INT. ENDURANCE - CONTINUOUS
Brand, crying, monitors Cooper’s lonely transmissions ...


EXT. GARGANTUA - CONTINUOUS
Ranger 2 PLUNGES towards the black hole. We hear Cooper’s
panic breathing get LOUDER and LOUDER until -
Ranger 2 SHUDDERS with EXPONENTIALLY RISING GRAVITATIONAL
ENERGY as it CROSSES THE HORIZON - PLUNGING TOWARDS THE
SINGULARITY - ALL WAVELENGTHS OF LIGHT CASCADING WITH HIM -
AS WE -
PLUNGE INTO ABSOLUTE ...

WHITE -
Not a whiteout - a SHIMMERING CAVALCADE OF ALL WAVELENGTHS:
LIGHT, SOUND, EVERYTHING ... the SPHERICAL INSIDE OF THE
BLACK HOLE, like a STAR turned INSIDE OUT. COOPER IS
SCREAMING and we CUT to -
BURNING CORN - men fighting a fire, Tom leading, GESTURING -
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama","Adventure"]

Summary Cooper and Brand clash over detaching from Tars to save themselves. Despite Brand's reluctance, Cooper chooses to depart, leaving Brand and Case to continue their mission. As Cooper's lander plummets towards the black hole, Brand and Case witness his sacrifice with fear and sorrow.
Strengths
  • High stakes
  • Emotional depth
  • Tension-filled action
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue may be a bit on-the-nose

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotional, and pivotal to the plot, with high stakes and significant character development.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of using a black hole's gravity to slingshot towards a distant planet is innovative and adds a unique twist to the typical space exploration narrative.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with a sense of urgency and tension as characters face critical decisions and challenges.

Originality: 9

The scene presents a fresh take on the space exploration genre, focusing on moral dilemmas and sacrifices rather than just technical challenges. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and emotionally resonant.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show depth, emotion, and growth, especially in moments of sacrifice and determination.

Character Changes: 8

Characters undergo significant changes, particularly in their willingness to sacrifice and their determination to save humanity.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal is to make difficult decisions that will ultimately save humanity, even if it means sacrificing personal relationships or facing the consequences of his actions.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal is to successfully navigate the dangerous situation around the black hole and transmit the quantum data to save humanity on Earth.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict is high, both internally within the characters and externally in the face of the challenges they must overcome.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the characters facing physical and moral challenges that test their resolve and decision-making. The audience is left uncertain of the outcome.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are incredibly high, as characters must make life-or-death decisions that will determine the fate of humanity.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing new challenges, decisions, and developments that impact the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the characters' unexpected decisions and the high level of danger they face. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict revolves around the idea of sacrifice for the greater good. Cooper must weigh the value of individual lives against the survival of the human race.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions from the characters and the audience, particularly in moments of sacrifice and desperation.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is impactful and serves to convey the characters' emotions and motivations effectively.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its high stakes, emotional depth, and intense action sequences. The audience is invested in the characters' fates and the outcome of their mission.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is fast-paced and intense, mirroring the urgency of the characters' situation. The rhythm of the action sequences and dialogue keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene is well-formatted and easy to follow, with clear transitions between locations and characters. The action is described effectively, enhancing the visual impact.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure of escalating tension and action, building towards a climactic moment of decision-making and sacrifice.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clarity in terms of the spatial and temporal relationships between the different locations and characters. It jumps between the cockpit of Ranger 2, the ring module of Endurance, the cockpit of the Lander, and the exterior of the Endurance without clear transitions.
  • The dialogue feels a bit rushed and lacks depth, especially in the interactions between Cooper, Brand, and Tars. There is an opportunity to add more emotional depth and tension to their conversations.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual descriptions to enhance the sense of urgency and danger as the characters navigate the intense situation around the black hole.
  • The emotional stakes of the scene could be heightened by delving deeper into the characters' motivations and fears, particularly Brand's reluctance to sacrifice Tars and Cooper's determination to save Earth.
  • The pacing of the scene could be improved by balancing the action sequences with moments of reflection or character development to give the audience a breather amidst the high-stakes situation.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding clearer transitions between the different locations to improve the flow of the scene and help the audience follow the action more easily.
  • Take the time to develop the dialogue further, adding emotional depth and complexity to the interactions between the characters to enhance the tension and drama of the scene.
  • Enhance the visual descriptions to create a more immersive and vivid picture of the intense situation around the black hole, adding to the sense of urgency and danger.
  • Dig deeper into the characters' motivations and fears to increase the emotional stakes of the scene, making the audience more invested in the outcome.
  • Balance the action sequences with moments of reflection or character development to improve the pacing of the scene and give the audience a chance to connect with the characters on a deeper level.



Scene 36 -  The Lunar Lander
INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) sits on the bed, looking into the BOX. She
pulls out the LUNAR LANDER MODEL, looks up at the books ...
137.


GETTY
(O.S.)
Come on, Murph! We don’t have much
time!


EXT. GARGANTUA - DAY
A BLACK DOT appears, RUSHING TOWARDS US to become - A DARK
SPHERE - we PLUNGE through it into SILENT DARKNESS - a WHITE
SPHERE races towards us -

Just as the wormhole was a spherical hole, THESE SPHERES ARE
HOLES WITHIN HOLES ... we are dropping through A
FOUR-DIMENSIONAL RABBIT HOLE -
LIGHT/DARK/LIGHT/DARK/LIGHT/DARK with BLINDING RAPIDITY -
the frequency almost SPEAKING. Cooper hangs on for dear life
-
COMPUTER VOICE
(O.S.)
FUEL CELL OVERLOAD. DESTRUCTION
IMMINENT. INITIATE EJECTION.

Cooper is LAUNCHED out of Ranger 2, which EXPLODES, and,
PULLED to one side, MISSES A WHITE HOLE - PLUNGING INSTEAD
TOWARDS A SMALLER GLASS-LIKE SPHERE -
Cooper slows as he falls towards this sphere, reminiscent of
the wormhole, but the light within is not stars but an
infinity of WORLD LINES - (paths of objects through
spacetime) -
Cooper PLUNGES INTO THE WORLD SPHERE ... As he falls his
SINGLE WORLD LINE stretches behind him - the INFINITE
FUTURES OF HIS WORLD LINE splitting ahead to all the
different possibilities in spacetime -
Cooper himself is now like a ring being pulled down a cone
of fabric. He STARES at the ORDERED CHAOS of world lines ...

As he SLOWS his past and future world lines BREAK UP so they
become like INFINITE REFLECTIONS IN PARALLEL MIRRORS ...
Cooper’s world line DROPS into a SMALL, SQUARE TUNNEL -


INT. THE TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Tight enough to feel BLINDINGLY FAST at first, but Cooper
(and his INFINITE OTHERS) is actually SLOWING ... Cooper
DESPERATELY reaches out, KNOCKING the sides of the tunnel,
TRYING to slow himself - GRAPPLING - KICKING ’BRICKS’ out of
138.


the ’walls’. He finally STOPS. Looks around in the SUDDEN
CALM, FLOATING, catching his breath. He reaches out to the
tunnel wall - CONFUSED -
Each ’brick’ is TIGHTLY PACKED PAPER ... PAGES ... BOOKS -
AS SEEN FROM BEHIND A SHELF ...
Cooper PUSHES against a book - it MOVES SLIGHTLY. Cooper
PUSHES, HARDER AND HARDER AND HARDER -
The book drops out of sight, revealing -

Murph, aged ten, wet hair, towel around her neck, TURNS,
STARTLED by THE BOOK FALLING FROM HER SHELF.
COOPER
Murph? Murph?

She can’t hear him ...

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - MORNING

Murph (ten) stands there, startled, STARING at the
bookshelves. At the book on the floor, a broken toy beside
it ...

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT

Murph (forty) looks at the bookshelves, REMEMBERING ...

INT. THE TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS

Cooper watches Murph (ten) cautiously approach - she
CROUCHES. Picks something up -

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT

Murph (forty) turns the lunar lander in her hands. Thinking.

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - DAY

Murph (ten) stands up holding the broken LUNAR LANDER ...
139.


INT. THE TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper watches Murph (ten) examine the two pieces of the
LUNAR LANDER MODEL -
COOPER
MURPH! MURPH!
She turns ... leaves the room ... Cooper floats there,
staring. He LOOKS around - each ’wall’ of the tesseract is a
different view of Murph’s bedroom, so that by rotating he
can effectively orbit her room ...
He claws his way down to the next book wall. PUNCHES out two
books -
Murph’s bedroom, empty. The door opens, Cooper’s EARLIER
SELF is standing there, staring at the room, perturbed.
Murph (ten) joins Cooper, staring at the empty room ...
Cooper LASHES out at the books - kicks a book out - SPOTS -
Murph (ten) closes her door, crying, sliding the desk in
front -
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Drama"]

Summary Murph (forty) reflects on her past, holding a lunar lander model. Simultaneously, Cooper, in a tesseract, tries to communicate with Murph (ten) at different ages, but she remains unaware of his attempts.
Strengths
  • Unique concept of the tesseract
  • Emotional depth of characters
  • Visual storytelling
Weaknesses
  • Minimal dialogue may leave some viewers confused

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging, emotionally impactful, and introduces a pivotal concept that drives the narrative forward.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of the tesseract and the exploration of different timelines and connections between characters are executed brilliantly, adding depth to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot is advanced significantly through the revelation of the tesseract and the emotional impact it has on the characters.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces fresh and original concepts related to spacetime, world lines, and parallel mirrors. The dialogue and actions of the characters feel authentic and engaging.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters' reactions to the tesseract revelation showcase their emotional depth and complexity.

Character Changes: 8

The characters experience a significant shift in their understanding of time and connection, leading to personal growth.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to understand the concept of world lines and navigate through the different possibilities in spacetime. This reflects his curiosity, intelligence, and determination to solve complex problems.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal is to survive the fuel cell overload, ejection, and navigate through the different spheres and world lines. This reflects the immediate challenge he is facing in the scene.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict arises from the characters' struggle to understand the tesseract and its implications.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with Cooper facing challenges such as fuel cell overload, ejection, and navigating through the complex world lines and spheres.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high as the characters grapple with the implications of the tesseract and its impact on their lives.

Story Forward: 9

The scene propels the story forward by introducing a key concept and setting up future developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable due to the rapid changes in light and darkness, unexpected twists in Cooper's journey, and the philosophical conflicts introduced.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around the concept of order and chaos, as Cooper navigates through the world lines and infinite reflections. It challenges his beliefs about determinism and free will.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The emotional impact of the scene is profound, especially as it delves into themes of love, loss, and connection.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue is minimal but impactful, focusing more on visual storytelling and character reactions.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its intense action sequences, mysterious atmosphere, and exploration of complex scientific concepts.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by creating tension, suspense, and a sense of urgency as Cooper navigates through the different spheres and world lines.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, action lines, and dialogue.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with a clear progression of events and a focus on character development.


Critique
  • The transition from Murph's bedroom to the tesseract is abrupt and may be confusing for the audience. Consider adding a smoother transition to help connect the two scenes seamlessly.
  • The description of Cooper's journey through the tesseract is visually complex and may be challenging for viewers to follow. Simplifying the visuals or providing clearer explanations can enhance the audience's understanding.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Murph in different time periods lacks clarity and may benefit from more explicit cues to indicate the communication across dimensions.
  • The scene contains a mix of past and present tense descriptions, which can be disorienting for the reader. Maintaining a consistent tense throughout the scene can improve the flow of the narrative.
  • The emotional impact of Cooper's interaction with Murph in the tesseract could be heightened by focusing on the father-daughter relationship and the significance of their connection.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief transition or visual cue to smoothly connect Murph's bedroom to the tesseract, helping the audience understand the shift in location.
  • Simplify the description of Cooper's journey through the tesseract to make it more accessible to viewers, focusing on key visual elements that convey the essence of the scene.
  • Provide clearer cues or indicators to differentiate between the interactions of Cooper and Murph in different time periods, ensuring that the audience can follow the communication across dimensions.
  • Maintain a consistent tense throughout the scene to improve the readability and coherence of the narrative, enhancing the overall storytelling.
  • Emphasize the emotional depth of Cooper's connection with Murph in the tesseract by highlighting their bond and the significance of their relationship, adding layers of complexity to the scene.



Scene 37 -  The Revelation
INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) feels the desk. She puts her hand on the back
of the chair, tilts it slightly, remembering -

INT. THE TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper watches Murph (ten) put A CHAIR ON TOP OF THE DESK.
The earlier Cooper nudges the door open -

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - EVENING
Murph (ten) sees the door NUDGING against the desk and chair
-
MURPH
Just go. If you’re leaving - just
leave now.
140.


INT. THE TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper, the frustrated observer, spins around to see his
EARLIER SELF nudging the door -
COOPER
(to his earlier self)
Don’t go, you idiot!
His Earlier Self shuts the door ...

COOPER
Don’t leave your kids. You goddamn
fool.
Cooper PUNCHES OUT books with all his strength -

COOPER
S ... T ...
Murph (ten) is watching, no longer scared, fascinated -
COOPER
A ... Y ...
Cooper STOPS. Catches his breath. Waits ...
Earlier Cooper lifts the chair off the table to enter.

Cooper watches his earlier self, FRUSTRATED -
COOPER
Stay, you idiot! Tell him, Murph!
Stay ...

As before, Cooper gives Murph the WATCH ... Murph THROWS THE
WATCH and TURNS AWAY ...
COOPER
Murph, tell him again! Don’t let
him leave ...!

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) picks up the notebook. Opens it. Finds the
word ’STAY’ ... looks up at the books, REALIZING ...
141.

INT. THE TESSERACT - DAY
Cooper is crying with frustration ...

COOPER
Murph, don’t let me leave ...
Cooper watches as his earlier self heads to the door -

COOPER
STAY!!
Cooper SMASHES a book from the shelf with all his might -
His earlier self turns back. Looks at the book. Then leaves.

Cooper rests his head against the books, SOBBING.

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT

Murph (forty) lowers her notebook, moves to the bookshelves,
IN AWE ...
MURPH
Dad ... it was you. You were my
ghost ...

She is crying. Joyful.

INT. THE TESSERACT - DAY

Cooper sobs at the back of the books. Lost ...
TARS
(over radio)
Cooper?

Cooper, STARTLED, turns. Tars is not there.
COOPER
You survived.

TARS
(over radio)
Somewhere. In their fifth
dimension. They saved us ...
COOPER
(frustrated)
Who’s ’They’? And why would they
help us?
142.


TARS
(over radio)
I don’t know, but they constructed
this three-dimensional space inside
their five-dimensional reality to
allow you to understand it ...
COOPER
It isn’t working -!
TARS
(over radio)
Yes, it is. You’ve seen that time
is represented here as a physical
dimension - you even worked out
that you can exert a force across
spacetime -

COOPER
(realizing)
Gravity. To send a message ...
Cooper looks around the infinite tunnel, infinite Coopers.

COOPER
Gravity crosses the dimensions -
including time -
Cooper THINKS ... He pulls himself up to a different wall,
starts counting books ...
And you have the quantum data, now
-
TARS
(over radio)
I’m transmitting it on all
wavelengths - but nothing’s getting
out ...
COOPER
I can do it -
Cooper HITS a book’s world line, sending a WAVE ...
TARS
(over radio)
Such complicated data ... to a
child ...
COOPER
Not just any child.
143.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Murph discovers the word 'STAY' in her notebook, realizing her father was her 'ghost.' Cooper, trapped in the tesseract, cries in frustration and attempts to communicate with Murph through gravity. The scene ends with Cooper grasping a way to send a message.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Innovative concept
  • Strong character development
Weaknesses
  • Complexity of interdimensional communication may be challenging for some viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally charged, innovative in its concept, and moves the story forward significantly. The high stakes, intense conflict, and deep emotional impact make it a standout moment in the screenplay.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of interdimensional communication through a tesseract is intriguing and well-executed. It adds depth to the narrative and explores complex themes of time, gravity, and connection.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly as Cooper tries to communicate with Murph across dimensions, leading to a pivotal moment in the story. The conflict and stakes are heightened, driving the narrative forward.

Originality: 9

The scene offers a fresh take on the concept of time, sacrifice, and love, blending science fiction elements with emotional storytelling. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters, especially Cooper and Murph, are deeply developed and their emotional arcs shine through in this scene. Their bond and the sacrifices they are willing to make for each other are central to the scene's impact.

Character Changes: 8

Cooper undergoes a significant emotional journey in this scene, grappling with his past decisions and trying to make amends. His desperation to communicate with Murph showcases a deep change in his character.

Internal Goal: 9

The protagonist's internal goal is to come to terms with her past and understand the significance of her father's actions. She is seeking closure and emotional resolution.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal is to decipher the message left by her father and make sense of the complex data transmitted by TARS.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Cooper's past and present selves, as well as the conflict of trying to communicate across dimensions, creates a tense and gripping atmosphere in the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with internal conflicts, emotional barriers, and external challenges that the characters must overcome. The audience is left uncertain about the outcome, adding tension and suspense to the scene.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as Cooper tries to communicate with Murph across dimensions, facing the possibility of losing his connection to his daughter forever. The outcome of this communication could have far-reaching consequences.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing crucial information about interdimensional communication and deepening the emotional bond between characters. It sets the stage for the climax of the screenplay.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because of the unexpected twists in the characters' actions and the revelation of new information. The audience is kept on edge, unsure of how the characters' choices will impact the story.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict revolves around the themes of sacrifice, love, and the nature of time. Cooper's actions challenge the protagonist's beliefs about family and the sacrifices made for loved ones.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The emotional impact is profound, with themes of love, sacrifice, and connection resonating strongly. The scene evokes a range of emotions from joy to frustration to deep sadness.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotional turmoil and desperation of the characters. It adds depth to their interactions and enhances the scene's impact.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional intensity, philosophical depth, and the high stakes involved. The audience is drawn into the characters' internal struggles and the larger mysteries of the narrative.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-executed, with a balance of emotional beats, action sequences, and moments of reflection. The rhythm of the scene enhances its effectiveness and keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of the scene is clear and effective, with distinct transitions between locations and timelines. The use of visual cues and descriptive language enhances the reader's understanding of the complex narrative.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a non-linear structure that enhances the emotional impact and thematic depth. The shifts between locations and timelines add complexity and richness to the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene transitions between Murph's bedroom and the tesseract are a bit abrupt and may be confusing for the audience to follow.
  • The emotional intensity of the scene is conveyed well, but the dialogue could be more impactful and poignant to enhance the emotional connection between Cooper and Murph.
  • The use of the tesseract as a storytelling device is intriguing, but the execution could be clearer to ensure the audience understands the concept and its significance.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual cues to help differentiate between the different timelines and locations, making it easier for the audience to follow the narrative.
  • The interaction between Cooper and his earlier self could be more dynamic and engaging to heighten the tension and emotional impact of the scene.
Suggestions
  • Consider refining the transitions between Murph's bedroom and the tesseract to make them smoother and more coherent.
  • Enhance the dialogue to evoke a stronger emotional response from the audience and deepen the connection between Cooper and Murph.
  • Clarify the concept of the tesseract and its role in the scene to ensure the audience understands its significance in the story.
  • Add visual cues or cues in the dialogue to help differentiate between the different timelines and locations, improving the clarity of the narrative.
  • Explore ways to make the interaction between Cooper and his earlier self more dynamic and impactful, enhancing the tension and emotional depth of the scene.



Scene 38 -  Communication Across Time
INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) stands there, looking at her old notebook -
the page that says ’STAY’ ...
GETTY
(O.S.)
MURPH?! COME ON!
She looks around the room, SEARCHING for an answer ...


EXT. THE TESSERACT - DAY
Cooper watches Murph (ten) looking out the window ...
TARS
(over radio)
Even if you communicate it here,
she wouldn’t understand its
significance for years ...
Cooper is seized by a sudden anger -

COOPER
Then figure something out!
Everybody on Earth is going to die!
TARS
Cooper, they didn’t bring us here
to change the past.
Cooper hears something in this -
COOPER
We brought ourselves here ...
Cooper PUSHES off, looking through the gaps in the books.
Murph’s bedroom, full of DUST in the DUST STORM -

COOPER
Tars, feed me the coordinates of
NASA in binary ...
Cooper is in the room now, drawing a pattern in the dust ...

Cooper watches Murph (ten) burst into the room. Murph stops
and stares at the dust as Cooper’s Earlier Self comes in
past her, SLAMS the window shut - sees the PATTERN of dust
...
144.


INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) runs her finger along the DUST of the
windowsill ... She turns to look around the room.
Frustrated.

MURPH
Come on, Dad. Is there something
else here ...?


INT. TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper looks up from the floor -
COOPER
Don’t you see, Tars? I brought
myself here. We’re here to
communicate with the
three-dimensional world. We’re the
bridge ...
Cooper moves to another iteration of Murph’s room. Murph
(ten) JUMPS up - GRABS the WATCH, RUNS out the door ...

INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) looks at the watch, remembering. The second
hand TWITCHES. She drops the watch back into the box ...

INT. TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS
Cooper pushes himself along the world line of the books ...

COOPER
I thought they chose me - they
never chose me - they chose Murph.
TARS
(over radio)
For what?
COOPER
To save the world!

Murph (ten) comes back into her bedroom, SOBBING. She is
holding the watch. She puts it on the shelf.
145.


INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT
Murph (forty) puts the box back on the shelf. SIGHS ...

INT. TESSERACT - CONTINUOUS

Cooper races FASTER and FASTER down the world lines.
COOPER
’They’ have access to infinite
time, infinite space ...
Cooper gestures at the INFINITIES in all directions ...
COOPER
But no way to find what they need -
but I can find Murph and find a way
to tell her - like I found this
moment -
TARS
(over radio)
How?
COOPER
Love, Tars. Love - just like Brand
said - that’s how we find things
here.

TARS
(over radio)
So what are we here to do?
Cooper looks around the tesseract. The watch sits there on
the shelf for as long as he can see ...
COOPER
The watch. That’s it. She’ll come
back for it -

TARS
How do you know?
COOPER
Because I gave it to her. We use
the second hand. Translate the data
into Morse and feed it to me -
Tars starts to transmit. Cooper GRABS the second-hand world
line - starts to MANIPULATE it, sending waves down the world
line ...
146.


TARS
What if she never came back for it?
COOPER
She will. She will ... I feel it
...

The second hand is FLICKING back and forth ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper, stranded in the tesseract, realizes his mission is to send data to Earth. TARS assists him in transmitting binary coordinates using the watch's second hand in Morse code. Back in the present, adult Murph discovers the pattern in her childhood bedroom and attempts to decipher it.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Innovative concept
  • Poignant dialogue
Weaknesses
  • Complexity of time and space elements
  • Potential confusion for some viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally impactful, with a strong concept and plot development. The dialogue is poignant and serves to deepen the characters' relationships and motivations.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using love as a bridge to communicate across dimensions is innovative and thought-provoking. It adds depth to the story and explores themes of sacrifice and connection.

Plot: 8

The plot advances significantly in this scene, with key revelations and character developments. The tension and emotional stakes are high, driving the narrative forward.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh approach to the concept of communication across dimensions, blending emotional storytelling with scientific concepts in a unique and engaging way.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters' emotions and relationships are central to this scene, with Cooper's love for his daughter driving the action. The depth of their connections adds layers to the story.

Character Changes: 8

Cooper undergoes a significant emotional transformation in this scene, realizing the power of love and sacrifice. His connection with his daughter deepens, leading to a profound change in his perspective.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal is to find a way to communicate with Murph and save the world, reflecting his deep desire to make amends and fulfill his purpose.

External Goal: 7.5

The protagonist's external goal is to use the watch as a means of communication with Murph and ensure she comes back for it, reflecting the immediate challenge of connecting with her across dimensions.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 7

The conflict in the scene is primarily internal, as characters grapple with their emotions and the choices they must make. The emotional stakes are high, driving the tension.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, with the protagonist facing internal and external challenges that drive the conflict and propel the narrative forward.

High Stakes: 8

The stakes are high in this scene, as characters grapple with the fate of humanity and the choices they must make. The emotional and narrative stakes drive the tension and drama.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, revealing key information and advancing the characters' relationships. It sets the stage for the climax of the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8.5

This scene is unpredictable in its exploration of communication across dimensions and the protagonist's emotional journey, keeping the audience on edge and curious about the outcome.

Philosophical Conflict: 8

The philosophical conflict revolves around the concept of love as a powerful force for communication and connection, challenging the protagonist's beliefs about the nature of time and space.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotionally impactful, with moments of sadness, hope, and determination. The depth of feeling resonates with the audience, creating a powerful connection.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is poignant and reflective, capturing the emotional depth of the characters' experiences. It enhances the themes of sacrifice and love.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging due to its blend of emotional drama, scientific intrigue, and philosophical depth, keeping the audience invested in the characters' journey.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene effectively builds tension and emotional resonance, allowing the audience to absorb the complex themes and character dynamics at play.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting adheres to the expected format for a sci-fi screenplay, effectively conveying the visual and emotional elements of the scene.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a non-linear structure that mirrors the protagonist's journey across dimensions, effectively conveying the complexity of the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene transitions between Murph's bedroom and the tesseract are a bit abrupt and could be smoother to enhance the flow of the narrative.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and TARS could be more impactful and emotionally charged to convey the urgency of the situation and the stakes involved.
  • The emotional depth of the scene could be further explored to evoke a stronger connection between Cooper and Murph, especially considering the gravity of the situation.
  • The visual elements of the scene, such as the dust pattern and the watch, could be emphasized to create a more visually engaging and symbolic representation of the communication between Cooper and Murph.
  • The resolution of the scene, with Cooper manipulating the second-hand of the watch to send waves of data to Murph, could be more clearly depicted to ensure the audience understands the significance of this moment.
Suggestions
  • Consider refining the transitions between Murph's bedroom and the tesseract to create a more seamless narrative flow.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Cooper and TARS to convey the emotional intensity of the scene and the high stakes involved in communicating with Murph.
  • Explore the emotional depth of the scene further to strengthen the connection between Cooper and Murph and emphasize the importance of their communication.
  • Amplify the visual elements of the scene, such as the dust pattern and the watch, to visually represent the communication between Cooper and Murph in a more impactful way.
  • Clarify the resolution of the scene by clearly depicting how Cooper manipulates the second-hand of the watch to send waves of data to Murph, ensuring the audience understands the significance of this moment.



Scene 39 -  Hope Amidst Despair
INT. MURPH’S BEDROOM - TWILIGHT

Murph (forty) turns to leave ...
GETTY
(O.S.)
MURPH, HE’S COMING!

She pauses. Goes back to the box - reaches in. PULLS OUT THE
WATCH ... staring at it ... wondering ...
GETTY
(O.S.)
MURPH?! MURPH ...?!

EXT. FARMHOUSE - TWILIGHT
Getty is holding a tire iron, watching TOM’S TRUCK APPROACH.
Lois and Coop STARE, FEARFUL, from the truck ...
Tom APPROACHES, BLACK from soot ...
Murph BURSTS out of the house ... right up to Tom ...

MURPH
Tom, he came back ... he came back
...
TOM
Who?

She holds up the watch ...
MURPH
Dad. It was him. All this time ...
it was him. He’s going to save us
...
CLOSE ON the second hand of the watch, FLICKING back and
forth -
147.


INT. PROFESSOR BRAND’S OFFICE - DAY
Murph furiously TRANSCRIBES the movements of the second hand
-


INT. CORRIDOR, NASA - LATER
Murph, papers in hand, RUNS down the corridor, BUMPS into
Getty - doesn’t stop ...


INT. LAUNCH FACILITY - CONTINUOUS
Murph runs to the railing of the catwalk above the enormous
construction, looks down at the thousands of workers below.
Getty comes out after her, curious. She looks at him, then
SHOUTS OUT to the enormous space ...
MURPH
EU-RE-KA!
She turns to Getty - GRINNING.
Well, it’s traditional.
She THROWS her paper out over the railing -
EUREKA!!
Workers look up to see her papers flitting down ...


EXT. THE TESSERACT - DAY
Cooper looks out at the world line of the watch, of Murph,
as it leads out into infinite complexity ...

COOPER
Did it work?
TARS
(over radio)
I think it might have.
COOPER
(hopeful)
Why?

TARS
(over radio)
Because the bulk beings are closing
the tesseract ...
148.


Cooper looks out to the distance - it is RAPIDLY
APPROACHING, WORLD LINES BECOMING WORLD SHEETS, BECOMING
BULKS ...
COOPER
Don’t you get it, yet, Tars? ’They’
aren’t ’beings’ ... they’re us ...
trying to help ... just like I
tried to help Murph ...
TARS
(over radio)
People didn’t build this tesseract
-
COOPER
Not yet ... but one day. Not you
and me but people, people who’ve
evolved beyond the four dimensions
we know ...
The tesseract EXPANSION BACK INTO FIVE DIMENSIONS IS ALMOST
UPON THEM - Cooper BRACES HIMSELF -

COOPER
What happens now -?
BAM - he is swept up in the expansion like a tiny leaf on a
CHURNING WAVE -
Cooper FLIES through the EXPANDING COSMOS, past PLANETS
ORBITING STARS, WHICH BECOME ATOMIC PARTICLES, WHICH BECOME
MATTER, BECOMING STARS ...

Cooper APPROACHES A GLASSY TUBE. Inside is the OLD,
UNDAMAGED ENDURANCE. As Cooper looks in from the bulk he
sees: Brand, strapped in, Doyle opposite, traversing the
wormhole for the first time ...
Cooper REACHES for Brand ... She sees something, reaches up
- their hands would touch if they weren’t in different
dimensions, her fingers distorting the space of his fingers
-
WHAM! She, and the Endurance, are SWEPT PAST - Cooper is
SMASHED into the spacetime of the wormhole - he SCREAMS AND
WE -
149.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Murph's discovery of her father's watch sparks hope and leads to a breakthrough in decoding the watch's movements. Cooper witnesses the creation of the tesseract and embarks on a transformative journey through the cosmos.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Innovative concepts
  • Character development
  • High stakes
Weaknesses
  • Complexity of concepts may be challenging for some viewers

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful, emotionally charged, and pivotal to the plot, with a strong focus on character development and the resolution of key conflicts.


Story Content

Concept: 9

The concept of using a tesseract to communicate across time and space, the revelation of Cooper as Murph's 'ghost', and the sacrifice of TARS are all innovative and thought-provoking.

Plot: 9

The plot is engaging, with significant developments in the story, including the resolution of key conflicts, the revelation of Cooper's true role, and the sacrifice made to save humanity.

Originality: 8

The scene introduces fresh ideas about time, love, and sacrifice, while also exploring complex emotional dynamics between characters.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters show depth, emotion, and growth, particularly in the revelation of Cooper's connection to Murph and the sacrifice made by TARS.

Character Changes: 8

Cooper undergoes a significant realization about his role in Murph's life, leading to a change in his perspective and actions.

Internal Goal: 8

Murph's internal goal is to find closure and understanding about her father's disappearance and to reconnect with him on an emotional level.

External Goal: 7

Murph's external goal is to convince Tom that their father has returned and is going to save them.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 8

The conflict between the characters, the high stakes of the situation, and the internal struggles faced by Cooper and Murph create tension and drive the narrative forward.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene adds conflict and suspense, keeping the audience engaged and uncertain about the outcome.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high, with the fate of humanity hanging in the balance, leading to difficult decisions and sacrifices.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by resolving key conflicts, revealing important information, and setting up the next stage of the narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable due to the unexpected twists in the plot and character revelations.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the idea of time, love, and sacrifice. Cooper's realization about the nature of the 'bulk beings' challenges traditional beliefs about humanity's place in the universe.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions, particularly in the revelation of Cooper as Murph's 'ghost' and the sacrifice of TARS, leaving a lasting impact on the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue is impactful, emotional, and drives the key revelations and decisions in the scene.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of its emotional intensity, high stakes, and philosophical depth.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension, suspense, and emotional impact.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The scene follows standard formatting conventions for its genre, with clear scene headings and action descriptions.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with well-defined character arcs and plot progression.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clarity in terms of transitions between different locations and timeframes, making it confusing for the audience to follow.
  • The emotional impact of Murph discovering her father's presence through the watch could be heightened with more emphasis on her reaction and realization.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and TARS about the bulk beings and the tesseract feels rushed and could benefit from more depth and explanation.
  • The visual representation of Cooper flying through the expanding cosmos and encountering the old Endurance could be more visually engaging and impactful.
  • The scene could benefit from more seamless transitions between the different dimensions and timelines to enhance the audience's understanding.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual cues or transitions to clearly differentiate between the different locations and timeframes.
  • Enhance the emotional impact of Murph's discovery by focusing on her reaction and realization in a more detailed manner.
  • Expand on the dialogue between Cooper and TARS to provide more context and depth to the concept of the bulk beings and the tesseract.
  • Improve the visual representation of Cooper's journey through the expanding cosmos to make it more visually engaging and immersive.
  • Work on creating smoother transitions between the different dimensions and timelines to improve the flow and coherence of the scene.



Scene 40 -  Cooper Station Arrival
INT. OUTER SPACE - LATER
Cooper FLOATS, dead or unconscious, near Saturn. In the
distance we see two Rangers approaching ...

INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY
Cooper’s eyes flicker open. A bright room with an open
window, net curtains obscuring the view. We hear the CRACK
of a baseball off a bat. Children LAUGHING.
VOICE
(O.S.)
Mr Cooper? Mr Cooper?

Cooper looks over to see a Nurse and a Doctor watching him.
He tries to sit up.
DOCTOR
Take it slow, sir. Remember you’re
no spring chicken any more.
(Amused.)
I gather you’re one hundred and
twenty-four years old.
(Checks Cooper’s chart.)
You were extremely lucky. The
Rangers found you with only minutes
left in your oxygen supply -
COOPER
Where am I?

The Doctor, almost surprised, TURNS, moves to the window,
opens the curtains. Where Cooper should see sky, he sees a
CURVING UPSIDE-DOWN TOWN ...
DOCTOR
Cooper Station. Currently orbiting
Saturn.
The Nurse helps Cooper to the window. He looks out at the
VAST CYLINDRICAL STATION - cornfields and buildings. Outside
his window, kids are playing baseball. The batter hits a POP
FLY ... the kids watch it up and up, until it carries on,
falling up towards the buildings above. The kids SHOUT a
warning - the ball smashes a skylight. Cooper watches the
kids laugh.
COOPER
Nice of you to name the place after
me.
The Nurse giggles. The Doctor shoots her a look -
150.


What?
DOCTOR
The station wasn’t named after you,
sir ... It was named after your
daughter.

Cooper smiles at this ...
DOCTOR
Although, she’s always maintained
just how important you were -
COOPER
Is she ...
(Braces.)
still alive?

DOCTOR
She’ll be here in a couple weeks.
She’s really far too old for a
transfer from another station, but
when she heard you’d been found ...
well, this is Murphy Cooper we’re
talking about.
COOPER
(marveling)
Yes, it is ...

The Doctor is wrapping up -
DOCTOR
We’ll have you checked out in a
couple days.

Cooper turns back to the window, thinking ...
ADMINISTRATOR
(V.O.)
I’m sure you’ll be excited to see
what’s in store ...
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper awakens on Cooper Station, learning he's 124 and was found near Saturn. The station, named after his daughter Murphy, hosts an upside-down town. Murphy's arrival is imminent, leaving Cooper anticipating their reunion.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Innovative concept
Weaknesses
  • Limited focus on external conflict
  • Some exposition-heavy dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively combines emotional depth with the wonder of space exploration, creating a poignant and memorable moment.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a father and daughter reuniting in space after a long separation is both innovative and emotionally resonant.

Plot: 7

The plot advances through the revelation of Cooper's survival and his reunion with his daughter, adding a layer of emotional complexity to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a fresh take on the sci-fi genre by focusing on personal relationships and emotional themes within a futuristic setting. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds depth to the narrative and creates a sense of realism in the speculative world.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters, especially Cooper and his daughter, are well-developed and their emotional journey adds depth to the scene.

Character Changes: 7

Cooper undergoes a significant change from near-death to reuniting with his daughter, showcasing his resilience and love for his family.

Internal Goal: 8

Cooper's internal goal in this scene is to reconnect with his daughter, Murphy, and to come to terms with the passage of time and his own mortality. This reflects his deeper need for family connection and a sense of legacy.

External Goal: 7

Cooper's external goal in this scene is to understand where he is and how he ended up there. He is also trying to process the information about his daughter and her upcoming visit. This reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges he is facing in this new environment.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 5

While there is some conflict in Cooper's survival and the challenges he faces, the focus is more on emotional resolution and reunion.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene is strong enough to create tension and conflict for the protagonist, particularly in his internal struggle with his age and legacy. The uncertainty surrounding his daughter's visit adds a layer of complexity to the narrative.

High Stakes: 6

The stakes are high in terms of Cooper's survival and the emotional impact of his reunion with his daughter, but the focus is more on personal relationships.

Story Forward: 7

The scene moves the story forward by resolving the mystery of Cooper's fate and setting up new dynamics for the characters.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces unexpected twists in Cooper's situation, such as the revelation about his daughter and the unique setting of the space station. The audience is kept on their toes, unsure of how the protagonist will navigate this new environment.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around themes of family, legacy, and the passage of time. Cooper is confronted with the reality of his age and the impact it has had on his relationships, particularly with his daughter. This challenges his beliefs about his own importance and the value of family connections.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions through the reunion of Cooper and his daughter, tapping into themes of love and connection.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the emotions and relationships between the characters, enhancing the impact of their reunion.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it combines emotional depth with futuristic elements, creating a sense of intrigue and curiosity about the protagonist's journey. The interactions between Cooper, the Doctor, and the Nurse draw the reader in and establish a connection to the characters.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by balancing moments of introspection with dialogue-driven interactions. The rhythm of the scene keeps the reader engaged and allows for emotional beats to land effectively.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene adheres to the expected format for its genre, with proper scene headings, dialogue formatting, and action descriptions. The visual elements are well-defined, enhancing the reader's understanding of the futuristic world depicted.

Structure: 8

The structure of the scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene transitions and character interactions that drive the plot forward. The pacing and rhythm of the scene contribute to its effectiveness in conveying the protagonist's internal and external goals.


Critique
  • The transition from Cooper floating near Saturn to waking up in a hospital room on Cooper Station feels abrupt and lacks a smooth connection.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and the Doctor feels a bit forced and cliched, lacking depth and authenticity.
  • The revelation that Cooper is 124 years old and the station is named after his daughter, Murph, is a significant moment but could be delivered with more emotional impact.
  • The scene lacks a sense of urgency or conflict, making it feel somewhat flat and lacking in tension.
  • The visual descriptions of the upside-down town and kids playing baseball are intriguing but could be further developed to create a more vivid and immersive setting.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a more seamless transition between Cooper floating near Saturn and waking up in the hospital room to improve the flow of the scene.
  • Enhance the dialogue between Cooper and the Doctor to make it more authentic and emotionally resonant, adding depth to their interaction.
  • Increase the emotional impact of the revelation about Cooper's age and the station being named after his daughter by exploring his reaction in more detail.
  • Introduce a sense of urgency or conflict to the scene to create more tension and engage the audience.
  • Further develop the visual descriptions of the upside-down town and kids playing baseball to create a more immersive and visually striking setting.



Scene 41 -  Tears of Time
INT. HANGAR, COOPER STATION - DAY
The ADMINISTRATOR, thirties, leads Cooper along a walkway -

ADMINISTRATOR
We’ve got a nice situation for you
...
151.


Cooper looks down at a line of SLEEK NEXT-GENERATION
RANGERS. Sees a PILOT climb into one. Mechanics work another
...
ADMINISTRATOR
I actually did a paper on you in
high school, sir. I know all about
your life on Earth ...

EXT. TOWN SQUARE, COOPER STATION - CONTINUOUS

Cooper looks at the strangely ordinary town the
Administrator is walking him through ...
ADMINISTRATOR
So when I made my suggestion to Ms
Cooper, I was delighted to hear
that she thought it was perfect ...

EXT. FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS

The Adminstrator leads Cooper through a cornfield ... The
old farmhouse is there, preserved. As Cooper approaches, a
small monitor starts playing the footage of OLD-TIMERS from
the start of the movie.
ADMINISTRATOR
Of course, I didn’t speak to her
personally ...
As Cooper passes the monitor it changes to a FAMILIAR OLD
LADY, but Cooper misses it ...


INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - CONTINUOUS
OLD-TIMERS play on video screens: a museum exhibit. The
Administrator holds the door open for Cooper.

ADMINISTRATOR
But she confirmed just how much you
loved farming.
COOPER
She did, huh?
Cooper looks over the kitchen. Cooper sees a
familiar-looking articulated machine -
152.


COOPER
Is that ...?
ADMINISTRATOR
The machine we found out near
Saturn when we found you, yes. Its
power source was shot, but we could
get you another if you want to try
and get it up and running again.
Cooper turns to the Administrator.

COOPER
Please.

INT. HANGAR, COOPER STATION - EVENING

Cooper, from the catwalk, watches the last of the Rangers
come back from patrol. The PILOT jumps down as the ground
crew wheels it into its place in the line of sleek ships.


INT. KITCHEN, FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
Cooper has Tars’ head laid out on the kitchen table.
TARS
Settings: general settings,
security setting -
COOPER
Honesty. New level setting.
Ninety-five percent.

TARS
Confirmed. Additional
customization?
COOPER
Yes. Humor, seventy-five percent.
Wait.
(Thinks.)
Sixty percent.


INT. HOSPITAL WAITING ROOM - DAY
Cooper enters, nervous. A nurse is there.
COOPER
Is she -?
153.


NURSE
The family’s all in there.
COOPER
The family?

NURSE
They all came along to see her -
she’s been in cryo-sleep for almost
two years.


INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - CONTINUOUS
Cooper cautiously pushes open the door. The bed is
surrounded by people, grown-up children, grandchildren,
babies ... They turn to look at him: some SMILES, some
CURIOUS looks, a small child HIDES behind a parent’s leg ...
Cooper approaches, and the family parts to let him see an
ELDERLY WOMAN, lying in the bed, FRAIL.
She looks up at Cooper. Delighted. Tears of joy. She reaches
up to him ... he takes her hands.
COOPER
Murph.
MURPH
Dad.
(To the others.)
Please.
Her voice is a frail whisper. With authority. The family
shuffles out. Cooper watches them go, turns back to Murph.

COOPER
You told them I like farming.
Murph smiles, still mischievous. Cooper marvels at her.

COOPER
Murph, it was me. I was your ghost.
MURPH
I know ...

She lifts her wrist - the WATCH is there ...
MURPH
People didn’t believe me, they
thought I’d done it all myself ...
(Taps watch.)
(MORE)
154.


MURPH (cont’d)
But I knew who it was ...
COOPER
A father looks in his child’s eyes
and thinks - maybe it’s them -
maybe my child will save the world.
MURPH
And everyone, once a child, wants
to looks into their own dad’s eyes
and know he saw. But, usually, by
then, the father is gone. Nobody
believed me, but I knew you’d come
back.
COOPER
How?
MURPH
Because my dad promised me.
Cooper is crying now.

COOPER
I’m here now. I’m here for you,
Murph.
Murph is shaking her head.

MURPH
No parent should have to watch
their child die. My kids are here
for me now. Go.

COOPER
Where?
MURPH
(it’s so obvious)
Brand.
And the family comes back in as Cooper releases Murph’s
hand, stepping back to let Murph’s kids and grandkids swarm
over her ... He watches them, their love, as if from another
dimension. A man out of time. A ghost.

MURPH
(V.O.)
She’s out there ...
155.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Cooper revisits Cooper Station, navigating through advanced hangars, a cornfield, and an old farmhouse. Intrigued by an old-fashioned machine, he commits to its restoration. He reunites with an aged Murph in the hospital, who had been in cryo-sleep. Despite her disappointment, Murph accepts his choice to leave for humanity's sake, leaving a lingering mystery as the scene ends.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Closure
  • Reunion theme
Weaknesses
  • Lack of external conflict
  • Predictable resolution

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally powerful, well-written, and serves as a satisfying conclusion to the character arcs established throughout the film. It effectively conveys themes of love, sacrifice, and redemption.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of a father reuniting with his daughter after a long absence is a universal and emotionally resonant theme. The scene effectively explores the idea of promises, redemption, and the enduring bond between family members.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene revolves around Cooper's emotional reunion with his daughter Murph and the revelation of his presence as her 'ghost'. It ties up loose ends and provides closure to the narrative.

Originality: 8

The scene offers a fresh take on the themes of family, sacrifice, and redemption, with a futuristic backdrop and emotional depth. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Cooper and Murph are well-developed and their emotional journey in this scene is compelling. Their relationship is central to the story and drives the emotional impact of the scene.

Character Changes: 8

Both Cooper and Murph undergo emotional growth and transformation in this scene. Cooper realizes the impact of his actions on his daughter, while Murph finds closure and forgiveness.

Internal Goal: 9

Cooper's internal goal is to reconnect with his daughter, Murph, and make amends for his absence in her life. He wants to show her that he cares and is there for her.

External Goal: 8

Cooper's external goal is to repair the machine found near Saturn and get it up and running again. This goal reflects his desire to contribute and make a difference in the new world he finds himself in.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 3

While there is emotional conflict in the scene, the focus is more on resolution and reconciliation rather than intense conflict.

Opposition: 6

The opposition in the scene is more emotional and internal, with Cooper facing the consequences of his choices and the impact on his relationship with Murph. The uncertainty of their reconciliation adds to the opposition.

High Stakes: 6

While the stakes are not as high in terms of action or danger, the emotional stakes for the characters are significant. The reunion between Cooper and Murph carries a weight of emotional significance.

Story Forward: 7

The scene provides resolution to key character arcs and moves the story towards a satisfying conclusion. It sets the stage for the final act of the film.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in terms of emotional twists and revelations, such as Murph's revelation about knowing Cooper's presence. The unexpected emotional depth adds to the unpredictability of the scene.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict revolves around the themes of family, sacrifice, and redemption. Cooper grapples with the consequences of his choices and the impact they have had on his loved ones.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of love, redemption, and closure. The reunion between Cooper and Murph is deeply moving and resonates with the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is heartfelt and poignant, effectively conveying the emotions of the characters. It adds depth to the reunion between Cooper and Murph.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because of the emotional depth, character development, and poignant moments of connection between characters. The audience is drawn into the heartfelt exchanges and moments of reconciliation.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is well-crafted, with a balance of emotional moments, character interactions, and revelations. The rhythm contributes to the effectiveness of the scene and keeps the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected formatting for its genre, with clear scene descriptions, character actions, and dialogue. The formatting enhances the readability and flow of the scene.

Structure: 9

The scene follows a well-defined structure, moving seamlessly between different locations and character interactions. The pacing and rhythm contribute to the effectiveness of the scene.


Critique
  • The scene transitions between different locations and time periods can be a bit abrupt and disjointed, making it challenging for the audience to follow along smoothly.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth and connection between Cooper and Murph in their reunion scene, considering the weight of their relationship and the passage of time.
  • The dialogue between Cooper and Murph feels a bit forced and lacks the natural flow of a heartfelt reunion between a father and daughter after a long separation.
  • The scene could benefit from more visual cues and emotional cues to enhance the impact of the reunion between Cooper and Murph, making it more poignant and memorable for the audience.
  • The pacing of the scene could be improved to build up the emotional tension and release it effectively during the reunion between Cooper and Murph.
Suggestions
  • Consider restructuring the scene to create a more seamless flow between different locations and time periods, allowing for a smoother transition for the audience.
  • Focus on developing the emotional connection between Cooper and Murph by adding more depth to their dialogue and interactions, capturing the complexity of their relationship over time.
  • Enhance the visual and emotional cues in the scene to create a more impactful and memorable reunion between Cooper and Murph, drawing the audience into their emotional journey.
  • Work on pacing the scene effectively to build up the emotional tension and create a more cathartic release during the reunion between Cooper and Murph, engaging the audience on a deeper level.
  • Consider adding subtle nuances and gestures to convey the depth of emotions between Cooper and Murph, allowing for a more authentic and heartfelt reunion scene.



Scene 42 -  Mourning and Preparation
EXT. EDMUNDS’ DESERT PLANET - DAY
Brand, in suit and helmet, stands watching Case excavate a
pod, buried under a massive rock fall. She is crying.
MURPH
(V.O.)
Setting up camp ...

EXT. HANGAR, COOPER STATION - NIGHT

MECHANIC finishes looking over one of the sleek new Rangers.
He packs his tools and heads out.
A figure unfolds itself in the shadows - Tars. He picks his
way through the shadows, unlocks the door. Cooper DARTS in
...

EXT. EDMUNDS’ DESERT PLANET - DAY
Brand kneels in front of a small CROSS. Edmunds’ nameplate
hangs from it.
MURPH
... Alone in a strange galaxy ...
She unseals her helmet - PULLS IT OFF ...


INT. HANGAR, COOPER STATION - NIGHT
Cooper and Tars scurry down the line of sleek ships. Cooper
points - Tars starts working the hatch mechanism, while
Cooper KEEPS WATCH ...

EXT. EDMUNDS’ DESERT PLANET - DAY
Brand, helmet off, BREATHES. And breathes again.

MURPH
(V.O.)
Maybe, right now, she’s settling in
for the long nap ...
156.


INT. RANGER IN HANGAR, COOPER STATION - NIGHT
Cooper STRAPS into the pilot’s chair, Tars beside him. The
outer doors slide open. They look out at the inky blackness
of space ...


EXT. EDMUNDS’ DESERT PLANET - DUSK
Brand looks at the setting sun ...

MURPH
(V.O.)
By the light of our new sun ...

INT. HANGAR, COOPER STATION - MORNING

The Mechanic opening up, walks along the row of ships until
-
One is MISSING.


EXT. EDMUNDS’ DESERT PLANET - DUSK
Brand turns from the dwindling light ...
MURPH
(V.O.)
In our new home.
She heads down through the twilight towards camp. And we -
Fade out.

Credits.
End.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Drama"]

Summary Brand kneels before Edmunds' cross, lost in contemplation. Meanwhile, Cooper and Tars prepare for launch. As the sun sets, Brand watches it with longing, while Cooper and Tars take their places in the ship. Brand descends the hill towards the camp, and the scene ends.
Strengths
  • Emotional depth
  • Character development
  • Reflective tone
Weaknesses
  • Minimal external conflict
  • Limited dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively captures the emotional journey of Brand as she comes to terms with her new life on the planet. The combination of reflective moments and a sense of hope creates a poignant atmosphere.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of starting anew on a distant planet after the events of the film is compelling and adds depth to the story. The scene effectively conveys the idea of moving forward and finding peace.

Plot: 7

The plot in this scene focuses on Brand's emotional journey and her acceptance of her new surroundings. While it doesn't advance the main plot significantly, it provides closure for her character.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces unique settings and themes, such as the desert planet, the space station, and the exploration of grief and acceptance in a sci-fi context. The characters' actions and dialogue feel authentic and emotionally resonant.


Character Development

Characters: 8

Brand's character is well-developed in this scene, showcasing her emotional depth and resilience. The scene allows for a deeper understanding of her as she navigates her new reality.

Character Changes: 8

Brand undergoes significant emotional growth and acceptance in the scene, transitioning from grief to a sense of peace and hope for the future. Her character arc is well-developed and impactful.

Internal Goal: 8

Brand's internal goal in this scene is to come to terms with the death of a colleague or loved one, as indicated by her emotional reaction at the grave site.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal is to continue with the mission or journey despite the emotional challenges she faces.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 3

There is minimal external conflict in the scene, focusing more on Brand's internal conflict and emotional journey. The conflict lies in her coming to terms with her new reality.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in the scene comes from the protagonist's internal struggles, emotional challenges, and the uncertainty of the future, creating a sense of tension and conflict.

High Stakes: 4

The stakes in the scene are more internal and emotional, focusing on Brand's journey towards acceptance and peace. While not high in traditional action-driven stakes, the emotional stakes are significant.

Story Forward: 6

While the scene doesn't propel the main plot forward significantly, it provides closure for Brand's character arc and sets the stage for a new beginning. It adds depth to the overall narrative.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable in terms of the emotional journey of the protagonist and the unexpected twists in the narrative.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict in this scene revolves around themes of grief, acceptance, and the search for a new home or purpose.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene has a high emotional impact, evoking feelings of sadness, hope, and longing in the audience. Brand's journey is deeply moving and resonates on a personal level.

Dialogue: 6

The dialogue in the scene is minimal but impactful, conveying Brand's emotions and inner thoughts effectively. It serves the purpose of highlighting her internal struggle and acceptance.

Engagement: 8

This scene is engaging because of its emotional depth, atmospheric descriptions, and the protagonist's internal struggles that draw the audience in.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension, emotional depth, and atmosphere, leading to a satisfying resolution.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 8

The formatting of the scene is clear and easy to follow, with proper scene headings and descriptions that enhance the visual storytelling.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with distinct locations and character actions that contribute to the overall narrative and emotional arc.


Critique
  • The scene lacks a clear connection to the preceding scenes, making it feel disjointed from the overall narrative.
  • There is a lack of emotional depth and character development in this scene, especially considering the weight of the previous events in the screenplay.
  • The transition between the different locations and characters is abrupt and could be smoother to enhance the flow of the scene.
  • The dialogue is minimal and does not contribute significantly to the scene or the characters' development.
  • The visual descriptions are sparse, missing an opportunity to create a vivid and engaging visual experience for the audience.
Suggestions
  • Consider incorporating elements from the preceding scenes to create a more cohesive and impactful conclusion to the screenplay.
  • Develop the emotional arc of the characters, especially Brand, to provide a more satisfying resolution to their journeys.
  • Work on smoother transitions between locations and characters to improve the overall flow of the scene.
  • Enhance the dialogue to add depth to the characters and convey their emotions and motivations effectively.
  • Provide more detailed and immersive visual descriptions to create a vivid and engaging visual experience for the audience.