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Scene 1 - The Temple
THE FIFTH ELEMENT

by

Luc Besson




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FADE IN:

EXT. DESERT NILE RIVER VALLEY - DAY

Somewhere in the Nile at the edge of the desert.

CREDITS ROLL

WRITTEN: EGYPT 1913

OMAR and his mule zigzag along the bottom of sun scorched
dunes.

EXT. TEMPLE EXCAVATION - DAY

The mule and the boy finally reach a camp. A few tents
dwarfed by a huge temple door jutting out of the sand. The
camp is deserted except for some kids by the temple entrance
holding large mirrors, reflecting light into the temple.

Omar leaves his mule in the shade, seizes two goatskins and
slips inside the temple.
Genres: ["Action","Adventure","Fantasy"]

Summary Omar and his mule, in Egypt 1913, reach a deserted camp in a desert with a temple door jutting out of the sand. Some kids holding large mirrors reflect light into the temple while Omar leaves his mule in the shade and slips inside the temple.
Strengths "Interesting setting and time period, mysterious tone, strong theme"
Weaknesses "Lacks strong character development and dialogue"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 2 - The Professor Deciphers the Inscription
INT. TEMPLE - DAY

Omar makes his way uneasily down a pillared corridor that
opens into a vast room where an old scientist stands on a
small wooden ladder in front of the wall across the room.
PROFESSOR MASSIMO PACOLI. A young man is beside him, BILLY
MASTERSON, age 25, an American student. He has a large
sketchpad in his hands.

Behind them AZIZ, age 10, whose job is to hold the last mirror
which shines light into the expansive room.

PROFESSOR
(deciphering)
"..when the three planets are in
eclipse.."

His fingers trace across the wall which is covered with
symbols and strange hieroglyphs as he deciphers.

PROFESSOR
"..the black hole like a door is
open... Evil comes ... sowing terror
and chaos..." See? The snake, Billy.
The Ultimate Evil ... make sure you
get the snake!

The Professor points emphatically to the snake, the symbol
of Evil, coming through the door between the three planets
in eclipse. C.U. Billy's hand sketches the snake quickly.

He is a natural artist.
2.

BILLY
And when is this door opening snake
act supposed to occur?

The Professor's fingers touch the signs.

PROFESSOR
..if this is the five..and this the
thousand..

He calculates.

PROFESSOR
Every five thousand years..

BILLY
(kidding)
So I have some time..

He reaches for the pad.

ANGLE ON: Omar. Standing at the entrance to the chamber
with the water bag, entranced by the sight. A skeletal hand
falls on his shoulder. Omar turns to an ancient PRIEST in a
rough milled black cannock.

PRIEST
I will take it to them my son.

Startled but obedient, Omar gives the water bag to the Priest.

PRIEST
Go with God.. be safe from Evil..

The Priest makes the sign of the Cross on the boy's forehead,
dismissing him.

As soon as he is gone, the Priest turns a worried eye to the
Professor.

ANGLE ON: The Professor is back to translating, Billy to
sketching.

PROFESSOR
"..then arrange the elements of life
against the Terror just so.."

His fingers run on.

PROFESSOR
"..Water..fire..earth..air..four
elements around the fifth.."

His fingers fall on the one element that has a human shape,
surrounded by all the others.
3.

The Priest opens the water skin and begins to pour a vial of
powder into the skin.

ANGLE ON: Aziz falling asleep. The mirror falls, the light
fails.

PROFESSOR
Aziz! Light!

The boy struggles to stay awake. The mirror comes up.

PRIEST
Lord forgive me.. they already know
too, much..

PROFESSOR
"..in which all the history of the
Universe resides ..all the
strength..all the hope..Protect us
from Evil.."

PRIEST (V.O.)
Amen..

The Professor turns to the Priest who is pouring water into
a tin cup from the skin.

PROFESSOR
Father.. it in the most extraordinary
thing.. the greatest find in
history..can you imagine the
implications.

PRIEST
Only too well... here you must be
parched..

He hands the cup to the Professor. The Professor takes it,
has it almost to his lips when..

PROFESSOR
I mean look.. it is like a battle
plan..

In his excitement he does not drink, much to the Priest's
chagrin.

PROFESSOR
Here the Good.. Here the Evil..

As the Priest looks up, Aziz the mirror boy, tips his mouth
under the water skin, drinking the leakage.

PROFESSOR
Here..

He points to the Five Elements.
4.

PROFESSOR
A weapon against evil. Amazing! I
am going to be famous.

PRIEST
Then let us toast to your fame!
Here Billy..

The Priest hands Billy a cup.

PRIEST
Drink!

PROFESSOR
To fame.. salud..

The Professor raises the cup to drink, and then...

PROFESSOR
We cannot toast with water.. Billy !
In my sack.. the Grappa!

The Priest watches, disconsolate, as the Professor tosses
away his water. Billy finishes his cup before running off
into the tunnel.

EXT. COLONNADE - DAY

A muffled SOUND grows steadily louder. Outside, a monstrous
linear shadow disturbs the kid's game and gradually darkens
the temple entrance.

INT. TUNNEL - DAY

Billy is looking for the grappa in the Professor's bag. He
comes upon a machine pistol.

When the muffled SOUND suddenly grabs his attention. He
leans toward the corridor and sees part of a spaceship appear.
Billy is paralyzed.

INT. TEMPLE ROOM - DAY

The Professor keeps reading over the inscription.

PROFESSOR
"..this perfect person.. this perfect
being.." I do not understand this..
perfect? Where is that boy? Billy!
Genres: ["Action","Adventure","Sci-Fi"]

Summary The Professor deciphers an inscription on the wall of a temple room that talks about an evil coming through a door between three planets in eclipse, which sows terror and chaos. Billy sketches the symbols in the inscription. The priest pours some water into a tin cup for the Professor. The Professor almost drinks it but instead talks about the inscription excitedly. Aziz, the mirror boy falls asleep, and the priest pours a vial of powder into the water bag. Meanwhile, Billy hears a spaceship and sees it outside.
Strengths "The scene sets up the conflict of an impending evil that the characters will need to face. It also introduces the different characters in the scene, their personalities, and their relationships. The dialogue is engaging and adds to the mystery of the inscription. The scene creates a curious tone that keeps the audience interested in what will happen next."
Weaknesses "The scene lacks an action sequence or any significant plot developments. The characters are not fleshed out enough to care about them yet. There is no emotional impact or conflict to keep the audience invested in the scene."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 3 - Theft of the Elements
INT. TUNNEL - DAY

Billy presses himself against the wall, in the shadows,
terrified, but sketching away like mad, as large shadowed
figures lumber past him. He begins to blink, feeling the
effects of the Priest's potion..
5.

INT. TEMPLE ROOM - DAY

The Professor reads the wall.

PROFESSOR
And this divine Light they talk
about.. what is Divine light?

At that moment, the reflection from Aziz's mirror drops again.
The light fails.

PROFESSOR
(without turning)
Aziz light!

The room is flooded with light all of the sudden.

PROFESSOR
Better.. this is the most unbelievable
thing I have ever seen..

The Professor turns around, and is stunned speechless to
find himself face to face with two MONDOSHAWANS. A dozen
others fill the hall manning the source of the light, large
luminous globes. Aziz is fast asleep.

PROFESSOR
(uncomprehending)
...Uh, yes?

The Professor is lifted up and carried off to the side by
the aliens. The KOMMANDER stops in front of the Priest who
is still on his knees, face to the ground.

PRIEST
Master... He was about to discover
everything, but I had the situation
under control.

The two MONDOSHAWAN GUARDS hold the professor three feet off
the ground.

PROFESSOR
(in a panic)
Who are you? Are you Germans?
Sprechen Sie Deutsch?

INT. TUNNEL

Billy staggers forward, a machine pistol in his hand.

INT. TEMPLE ROOM

The KOMMANDER holds out his hand to the Priest.

PRIEST
What did I do wrong?
6.

The Priest jumps to his feet excitedly.

KOMMANDER
Servant, you and the thousand guards
before you... You have done your
work well, but we have to recover
the elements. War will soon engulf
your planet. We must keep them safe.

The Kommander goes over to the wall and seems to be looking
for a lock. He finds it and slides in his metallic finger
which is more intricate than a key to a safe. He turns his
hand, activating a mechanism that opens the wall.

PROFESSOR
Unbelievable!!!

The Kommander turns around and crooks a finger. One of the
MONDOSHAWANS waves his hand, puts the professor to sleep and
heads down the hallway revealed by the opening. He is
followed by his men. The Priest slips in behind them.

INT. ROOM 2 - TEMPLE - DAY

The Kommander steps into a vast room. The ceiling is very
high, pyramid-shaped. In each corner of the room, four
vessels contain four rectangular twelve-inch stones-, the
four elements. In the middle, an opaque sarcophagus rests
on an altar. The Kommander stops and contemplates it a
moment.

PRIEST
(to himself)
The Fifth Element...

KOMMANDER
Take them and put them in a safe
place.

His men carry out his order.

INT. ROOM 1 - TEMPLE - DAY

Billy staggers across the floor, struggling to stay awake.

INT. ROOM 2 - TEMPLE - DAY

The Kommander opens a case. His men come and put the four,
precious stones in it, one by one.

PRIEST
(moved)
Will the elements be gone now forever
from this place?

KOMMANDER
When mankind comes to its senses.
7.

KOMMANDER
We will return.

PRIEST
Knowing mankind as I do, that could
take centuries!

KOMMANDER
Time is of no importance, only life
is important.

The Priest nods and lowers his eyes.

Angle on: Billy staggering forward, raising his pistol,
blinking his eyes to focus..

A MONDOSHAWAN puts the fourth element in the case The
Kommander shuts the case and looks at the Priest.

KOMMANDER
When EVIL returns so shall we.

PRIEST
(head lowered)
We will be ready, Lord.

Billy suddenly staggers into the room, brandishing his gun.

BILLY
Stop.

Billy trips, the gun goes off. He empties the clip. The
Mondoshawan carrying the case crumples to the ground. The
wall immediately begins to close. Billy fires wildly, unable
to control the powerful kicking gun.

PRIEST
No!!! Don't!!!

The Priest rushes Billy. The weapon has such a kick to it
that Billy starts shooting into the air, backs up, then
stumbles and knocks himself out. The Priest is on the ground,
seriously wounded. So is the Kommander. The WARRIORS are
in a panic.

CLERK
Hurry, Kommander! The wall's
closing!!!

The wall continues to close. Sand pours in from everywhere.
The vast room fills up like an hourglass.

KOMMANDER
A mission is a mission, Savoia.
You'll learn that.
8.

The Kommander picks up the case and reaches the wall but
can't get through it. His armor is too bulky, the opening
too small. He manages to get his arm and the case through.

KOMMANDER
My apologies to General Kroi -- and
my wife..

The wall closes, crushing his arm. The CLERK scoops up the
case and runs through the huge piles of sand.

EXT. COLONNADE - DAY

The CLERK boards the ship carrying the case. Omar hides in
a corner, frightened to death, hugging Billy's bag of
drawings.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action"]

Summary Billy, hiding in the tunnel, feels the effects of the potion and sketches while large shadowed figures pass him. The Professor discovers a divine Light, and soon faces two MONDOSHAWANS. The Priest tries to obstruct the progress, but the aliens overpower them, recover the elements, and leave while Billy unsuccessfully tries to stop them. The scene ends with the CLERK boarding the ship with the case and Omar, frightened and holding Billy's bag of drawings.
Strengths "Fast-paced action, lots of plot development, and tension."
Weaknesses "Some characters lack depth or development, and the dialogue could be more nuanced."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 4 - Evil Returns
INT. TEMPLE ROOM - DAY

The room fills with sand. The Priest's body is soon buried.

EXT. DESERT - DAY

The huge ship's main hatch closes.

EXT. TEMPLE - DAY

The ship lifts off and speeds away. Omar emerges from the
temple gaping at the ship as it vanishes in the sky.

EXT. PYRAMIDS

A gigantic shooting star flashes above the pyramids.

EXT. EARTH ORBIT

The ship passes in front of us and heads for the stars
disappearing at unbelievable speed. The background is a
star-spattered cosmos.

WRITTEN: 500 YEARS LATER

Another, more modern, spaceship, fills the screen. A warship
belonging to the Federal Army.

INT. SPACESHIP - CONTROL ROOM

CU of a digital control screen. Three planets projecting
three straight lines that crisscross at one point. Identical
to the one observed by the professor on the temple wall.
GENERAL STAEDERT looks out through the ship's window at one
of the three huge planets in eclipse.

STAEDERT
Don't you have anything? Not even a
temperature?
9.

CAPTAIN
The thermo-analyzers have jammed.
One of them reads over a million
degrees, the other's at minus 5000...
Never seen anything like it.

TECHNICIAN
It's taking shape.

EXT. SPACE

In the middle of the shadows, a door to the nightmare has
just opened. Evil is back. A round, moving mass, continually
changing color.

CAPTAIN
(in awe)
What the hell can it be?

TECHNICIAN
Hook-up with the president in one
minute, General.

General Staedert remains calm.

STAEDERT
...Send out a probe.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE MANHATTAN

LINDBERG, 50, the president of the United Federations, his
features lined and worn by various delegations, mainly
military, enters his office. There's a crisis in the air.
The President's AIDE leans down to his ear.

AIDE
On air in 30 seconds.

In the middle of the group is a Priest whose appearance
reminds us of Egypt. A younger man DAVID, 18, shy, a priest-
in-training attends the old man.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Adventure"]

Summary 500 years after an ancient temple burial, a modern spaceship encounters a mysterious mass and seeks the guidance of the president of the United Federations.
Strengths "The scene offers a sense of intrigue and mystery by presenting the unusual, unexplained mass. It also instills a sense of seriousness and urgency with the General's calm demeanor and the President's office setting. The theme of humanity's desire to explore the unknown is well represented."
Weaknesses "There is relatively little character development beyond the General and President, who are only briefly introduced. The young Priest-in-training and older Priest add little to the plot besides some visual interest and historical context."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 5 - Crisis Point
INT. CONTROL ROOM / PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

CAPTAIN
President on line sir..

General Staedert leans over his screen and seems surprised
to see the room but not the president.

PRESIDENT (O.S.)
Staedert, do you read me?

STAEDERT
I can hear you, Mr. President, but I
can't see you .
10.

The President grabs the mini-camera on his desk and yanks it
around to face him.

His face fills the screen.

PRESIDENT
(exasperated)
Is that better?

STAEDERT
Perfect, Mr. President.

PRESIDENT
I have to address the Supreme Council
in 10 minutes. Just the facts,
General.

STAEDERT
There are no results from the chemical
and molecular analysis as of yet,
all the calibers are overshot..we're
hoping a thermo nucleatic imaging...

PRESIDENT
(exasperated)
What you are saying is you don't
know what this..thing..is.

Consternation reigns in the President's office.

STAEDERT
Not yet Sir..The only thing we know
is it just keeps getting bigger!

PRESIDENT
Options.

STAEDERT
Wait or act.

PRESIDENT
Recommendations.

STAEDERT
My philosophy Mr. President is shoot
first ask questions later. I don't
like uninvited guests.

PRESIDENT
Gentlemen?

HEAD CHEMISTS
I think it would be foolish to shoot
at an organism that seems alive,
without first taking the time to
study it more! Besides, it has shown
no signs of hostility.
11.

PRESIDENT
(worried)
No... it's just getting bigger.

HEAD CHEMISTS
So do people, but that's no reason
to shoot them.

PRESIDENT
(exasperated)
The security of the Federated
Territories is and remains number
one priority.
(to the military)
I suppose General Staedert's
"philosophy" is acceptable to you?

All the Generals nod "yes"

PRESIDENT
All right, then! Staedert?

PRIEST (O.S.)
Mr. President?

The President scans the room. Staedert remote controls the
camera toward the room.

PRESIDENT
...Yes?

The camera moves up the Priest and we finally discover his
face. He is in his sixties, a shrewd look in his eyes.

Around his neck hangs the Kommander's finger, the key to the
temple.

PRIEST
Cornelius, Vito Cornelius. 50th level
parish. I have a different theory
to offer you, Mr. President.

PRESIDENT
I'm listening.

CORNELIUS
Imagine for a moment that this thing
is not anything that can be identified
because it prefers not to be, because
it is the antithesis of all we are.
Because it is evil.. TOTAL EVIL.

PRESIDENT
(a little sarcastically)
One more reason to shoot first eh?

All the Generals nod in agreement.
12.

CORNELIUS
Evil begets evil, Mr. President.
Shooting would only make it stronger.

INT. SPACESHIP

TECHNICIAN
The probe will attain its objective
in five seconds.

Staedert moves closer to the ship's window.

EXT. SPACE.

Evil swallows the probe and immediately bubbles over with
activity like a furious volcano.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

STAEDERT
Mr. President, we're at crisis point.

The President looks puzzled.

PRESIDENT
Your theory is interesting Father
but I don't think we have time to go
into it right now!

CORNELIUS
Time is of no importance, Mr.
President. Only life is important.

PRESIDENT
(exasperated)
That's exactly what we are going to
try and do: Protect the lives of
some 200 billion of our fellow
citizens! General? You may fire
when ready.

INT. SPACESHIP

STAEDERT
(cold) (to the CAPTAIN)
..Up front loading of a 120 ZZR
missile.

Marker lights on the objective.

EXT. OUTSIDE SPACESHIP

All of a sudden, outside the ship, the strange planet's
activity ceases. A black crust immediately covers it.
13.
Genres: ["Science Fiction"]

Summary The President, General Staedert, and head chemists discuss options for the unknown organism that keeps growing and getting stronger.
Strengths "Tense tone, well-written dialogue, good pacing"
Weaknesses "Limited character development, lack of emotional depth"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 6 - Alien Invasion
INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

SCIENTIST
(consulting new data)
Its structure has just solidified on
the surface, as if the object felt
something. If that's the case, we
are undoubtedly dealing with an
intelligence.

CORNELIUS
The most terrible intelligence
imaginable, Mr. President.

The President hesitates.

CAPTAIN
...The ship is in combat formation.
The missile is loaded, General.

PRESIDENT
(uneasy)
Staedert? Give me a minute...
I have a doubt.

STAEDERT
(cold)
I don't, Mr. President.

EXT. OUTSIDE SPACESHIP

The missile explodes from the ship and penetrates its target.
The explosion is swallowed like a fizzy pill in a small glass
of water. Nothing happens. And then the mass grows larger.

INT. CONTROL ROOM / PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

Staedert looks worried.

STAEDERT
Load a series of 740 missiles. Maximum
shield protection.

CAPTAIN
Yes, Sir.

The President is growing ever more worried.

PRESIDENT
Staedert? What's going on? Did you
destroy it?

STAEDERT
I'm about to, Mr. President.
14.

EXT. SPACESHIP

A series of three missiles heads for the planet, which absorbs
them all. And literally doubles in size.

SCIENTIST
The planet's diameter has greatly
increased and it's moving toward the
ship.

PRESIDENT
Staedert? Get out of there
immediately! I don't want an
incident, do you hear me, Staedert?

STAEDERT
(worried)
...What do we have that's bigger
than 240?

CAPTAIN
Nothing, General.

PRESIDENT
Staedert, get out of there! That's
an order!

A bead of sweat pearls Staedert's forehead. He is about to
give an order when a gigantic flame emerges from the planet
and literally swallows Staedert's spaceship.

STAEDERT
(eyes wide)
... Good God!

The flame fills the screen with a horrendous NOISE that....
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Thriller"]

Summary The President and his team face a terrifying alien invasion, trying to stop a planet from swallowing them up.
Strengths
  • Tension and suspense
  • Strong conflict
Weaknesses
  • Limited character development
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 7 - Korben Wakes Up
INT. APARTMENT

... wakes up a man trying to escape from a nightmare. KORBEN
DALLAS rubs his head. Thirty five years old, short hair,
powerfully built, unquestionable charm, good looking in spite
of the scars here and there. The alarm clock is still
ringing, it shows the date as March 18, 2359. It in two in
the morning. Ha grabs a cigarette, and stops to look for a
light. He shuts oft the alarm. He hears a cat mewing in
the hall. But it still rings. Korben takes a moment and
then realizes it in the phone that is ringing.

KORBEN
(to the cat)
I'm coming.

He grabs the phone and crosses his tiny apartment (27 feet
long by 6 feet wide) heading for the door, patting himself
for a light. Behind him, the bed makes itself automatically.
15.

KORBEN
(on the phone)
Yeah?

FINGER (V.O.)
Hey bud! Finger here.

He opens the door for the cat and starts to rummage through
a drawer for a match. Out come a handful of war decorations,
a hero's collection.

KORBEN
(to the cat)
Hi sweetie!

...A Medal of Honor Certificate to Major Dallas

FINGER (V.O.)
I love you too Major, but you haven't
called me that since basic training.

KORBEN
I was talking to the cat.

FINGER (V.O.)
Oh, yeah, I forgot.You still prefer
your cat to the real thing.

...A picture of Korben and his ex-wife on their wedding day.

KORBEN
At least, the cat comes back.

FINGER (V.O.)
(ironical)
You still pining for that two timing
bitch. Forget her. There are a
million women out there.

KORBEN
I don't want a million - I just want
one. A perfect one.

FINGER (V.O.)
Don't exist bud.

...A picture of Korben and Finger in uniform next to a space
fighter.

KORBEN
I just found a picture of you.

FINGER (V.O.)
How do I look?

KORBEN
Like shit.
16.

Korben finds a box of matches with three matches. He strikes
one. It does not light. Korben opens the fridge, bare, except
for an empty can of GEMINI croquettes.

On the packet is an ad:
WIN A DREAM TRIP FOR 2 TO FHLOSTON PARADISE.

FINGER (V.O.)
Must be an old picture.. Listen, you
gotta bring me your hack for the 6
month overhaul. A.S.A.P.

Korben heats up some brackish water.

KORBEN
(sighs)
I don't need one.

FINGER (V.O.)
You forgetting who sat next to you
for a thousand missions.
I know how you drive.

KORBEN
Finger! I'm driving a cab now, not
a space fighter!!

FINGER (V.O.)
How many points you got left on your
license?

KORBEN
(lying)
Uh... at least fifty.

FINGER (V.O.)
In your dreams! See you tonight!

Finger has hang up. Korben sighs and does the same. He
gets the heated brackish water and sits down. The cat pounces
on the table and meows for its food. Korben pours half the
coffee in the cat's cup.

The cat meows. Korben taps his cup to the cat's saucer.

KORBEN
Cheers!

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The office is emptied, only a few army officers remain. An
ancient manuscript, Billy's drawings, sits in front of the
President. Cornelius turns page after page, illustrating
his point.
17.

CORNELIUS
(to the President)
We have forty-eight hours, the time
it needs to adapt itself to our living
conditions.

PRESIDENT
(worried)
And then?

CORNELIUS
And then it will be too late. The
goal of evil is to wipe out life!
All forms of life. For all
eternity...Life upsets it.

The President appears upset himself by this image.

PRESIDENT
Is there anything that can stop it?

CORNELIUS
(knowing)
Yes..thank God..

EXT. SPACE

The Mondoshawan spaceship bursts through a star cluster and
fills the screen.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action"]

Summary Korben Dallas wakes up to a ringing phone and deals with a frustrating conversation with an old friend.
Strengths "The scene effectively shows the daily routine of Korben Dallas and his relationship with his cat. The phone conversation with Finger hints at Korben's past as a space fighter pilot."
Weaknesses "The scene is slow-paced and lacks significant plot developments that could drive the story forward. The conversation with Finger seems unimportant to the overall story."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 8 - The Mondoshawan Arrival
INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The manuscript is open on the President's desk..

CLOSE ON: Billy's rendering of the Mondoshawan.

CORNELIUS
(to the President)
The Mondoshawans don't belong to the
Federated Territories, but they are
peaceful... in their possession are
the four elements of life. These
elements when they are gathered around
a fifth: The Supreme Being, ultimate
warrior, created to protect life......

The SUPREME BEING is standing, as if frozen in armor. All
we see is the bottom half of his body. Big metallic gloves
hold the case engraved with the emblem of the three suns
containing the four Sacred Stones.

CORNELIUS
..will produce what the ancients
called the light of creation, the
light of total goodness which is the
only thing that can defeat EVIL.
18.

The President points to the spot occupied by the 5th element.

PRESIDENT
But what happens if instead of this...
Ultimate Warrior... it is EVIL who
stands here?

CORNELIUS
White turns to black. Light to Dark.
Life to Death. For all eternity.

The President's nerves quiver.

CAPTAIN
Sir, we have a Mondoshawan spaceship
at the frontier requesting permission
to enter our territory.

PRESIDENT
I guess I should make a decision..

CORNELIUS
They are the only ones who can help..

GENERAL
Sir..the Mondoshawan do not belong
to the federation. We do not know
their intention.. I must recommend
a full trinuclear assault..

PRESIDENT
(yells)
Did you see that..thing..swallow our
battleship like a gum drop? You
can't even tell me what it is!
I ask you for options you give me
bullshit. Give them permission to
enter our territories with my warmest
regards.

CORNELIUS
(relieved)
Thank you, Mr. President.

EXT. SPACE / INT. MONDOSHAWAN SHIP

The MONDOSHAWAN spaceship zips across the Federated Galaxy.

But it is not alone: Two black warships seem to be dogging
it.

INT. MONDOSHAWAN COCKPIT

The MONDOSHAWANS have spotted the spacecraft chasing them.

FIRST OFFICER
Two non-identified ships approaching.
19.

CAPTAIN
Must be the welcoming committee.

INT. WARSHIP COCKPIT

A MANGALORE sits at the controls of the warship. His
terrifying features tell us what sort of welcome they can
expect. The pilot fires without warning.

EXT. SPACE / INT. MONDOSHAWAN SHIP

The huge ship is badly hit and immediately swerves oft course.

Panic aboard the MONDOSHAWAN ship.

INT. MONDOSHAWAN SHIP

CAPTAIN
We've been hit! General alert!!!

Blast after blast hits the defenseless ship.

CAPTAIN
We're losing control! We have to
land fast!

The huge ship veers oft course and heads for a small red
planet, taking hit after hit.

CAPTAIN
Send out a distress signal!!! Activate
the emergency landing procedure!

The huge ship approaches the planet at blinding speed.

FIRST OFFICER
Impact in less than ten seconds!

The red planet looms ever closer.

CAPTAIN
Time is of no importance...

The ship crashes in a gigantic explosion.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action"]

Summary The President and his advisers discuss the importance of the Supreme Being and the four Sacred Stones, which are in the possession of the peaceful Mondoshawans. However, when the Mondoshawans are attacked by two black warships, they crash-land on a nearby planet.
Strengths "The scene efficiently introduces key characters, sets up the conflict, and establishes the importance of the Supreme Being and the four Sacred Stones. The dialogue is tense and engaging, and the action is well-paced."
Weaknesses "The scene could benefit from more character development and emotional depth. The President's decision to let the Mondoshawans in could have been more impactful if we had seen more of his inner conflict."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 9 - Korben's Apartment
INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - DAY

A thermo nuclear explosion fills a T.V. screen..Which Korben's
cat watches with interest.

Korben is about to exit the apartment.

KORBEN
Don't watch it all day, it'll rot
your mind. Bye sweetie..
20.

In response, the cat meows. Korben opens the door to..A
huge gun, brandished by a nervous MUGGER, pointing right in
his face.

MUGGER
The cash man!

KORBEN
Been here long?

MUGGER
Don't fuck with me man or I'll blow
you into tomorrow!

Unperterbed, Korben looks at the mugger's fearsome weapon.

KORBEN
Isn't that a Z140? Alleviated
titanium. Neuro charged assault
model?

MUGGER
(off balance)
Uh..

KORBEN
You know you could hurt someone with
this puppy..good thing it's not
loaded..

The mugger is lost. He looks at his weapon.

MUGGER
It's not?

KORBEN
You gotta push the little yellow
button...

Korben points to the button on the side of the gun. The
mugger takes his advice.

MUGGER
Thanks..

KORBEN
You're welcome..

And with lightning speed, Korben blasts the mugger with a
straight right hand, sending him down for the count. Korben
retrieves the gun.

KORBEN
..you know these things are VERY
illegal.. you could get in a shit
load of trouble.. I better hang
onto it for you..
21.

As the mugger clears his head, Korben opens a drawer next to
him which is full of similar guns! The mugger's eyes pop out
of his head. He scampers to his feet and runs off.

Korben shrugs, exits his apartment, and closes the door.
The cat watches a nuclear holocaust on T.V., uninterrupted.

INT. KORBEN'S GARAGE - DAY

Korben enters his taxi. A robotic voice greets him.

VOICE
Please enter your license..

Korben complies, and starts to push a series of buttons on
the dash.

VOICE
Welcome on board Mr. Dallas..

KORBEN
How you doing this morning? Sleep
OK? I didn't.

Korben hits a button. The garage door starts to open.

VOICE
Fuel level 6.03..Propulsion 2x4...

KORBEN
I had the worst goddamn nightmare.

VOICE
You have nine points left on your
license..

KORBEN
Thanks for reminding me..

As the garage door lifts, the Megalopolis that is New York
City in the 23rd century comes into view. Startling in it's
height, and breath.

VOICE
Have a nice day..

Korben lets the propulsion build.

KORBEN
Right..

He lets the gear slip. The taxi rockets off into the City.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

Cornelius collapses in a chair.
22.

CORNELIUS
We are lost!

GENERAL MUNRO
Mr. President, the attack was launched
by two unregistered warships.

PRESIDENT
Close all borders and declare a state
of general alert.

GENERAL MUNRO
Yes, sir.

PRESIDENT
(to another OFFICER)
Try to contact these Mondoshawans.
We owe them an explanation.

CORNELIUS
(lost, to himself)
What are we going to do?

PRESIDENT
This is government business now.
You ought to go home and get some
rest, Father.

The President motions to his guards to come and get Cornelius.

PRESIDENT
I promise to keep you informed.

A weary Cornelius leaves the room with David's help.

PRESIDENT
(to the CAPTAIN)
...Has the rescue team found any
survivors?
Genres: ["Action","Science Fiction"]

Summary Korben faces a mugger and disarms him with ease. He then shows off his collection of illegal weapons to the mugger before sending him on his way. Afterwards, he enters his taxi and heads off into the bustling city.
Strengths "Humorous dialogue, memorable character introduction of Korben"
Weaknesses "Lack of emotional impact or significant plot development"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 10 - The Mysterious Cell
INT. LABORATORY - 1ST DISTRICT - MANHATTAN - DAWN

An arm, on a surgical cart, moves down the hall of the
Nucleological Center, the most sterile of environments.

PROFESSOR MACTILBURGH, age 60, hurries alongside GENERAL
MUNRO.

MUNRO
This is all that survived?

MACTILBURGH
Actually only one cell survived..

MUNRO
Have you identified it?
23.

MACTILBURGH
It's not that easy..we've never
encountered anything like it
before..you see normal human beings
have 40 DNA memo groums..which is
more than enough for any species to
perpetuate itself... This one has
200,000.

MUNRO
Talk English Doc.

MACTILBURGH
This cell is like a huge library. It
has infinite genetic knowledge stored
inside. Almost like it
was...engineered.

MUNRO
Sounds like a freak of nature to me.

MACTILBURGH
Yes... I can't wait to meet him.

They pass into the lab.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Thriller"]

Summary Professor Mactilburgh explains the strange cell that survived and Munro expresses his confusion; the two enter the lab.
Strengths "The scene introduces a mysterious plot point that sets the stage for the story."
Weaknesses "The scene is a bit heavy on exposition."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 11 - The Supreme Being
INT. LABORATORY

The two enter a cylindrical laboratory. There is a huge
glass turbine in the middle with the metal glove inside. A
DNA chain scrolls on the computer screen.

MACTILBURGH
(rather fascinated)
The compositional elements of his
DNA chain are the same as ours, there
are simply more of them tightly
packed. His knowledge is probably
limitless..

MUNRO
(worried)
Is there any danger? Some kind of
virus?

MACTILBURGH
We put it through the cellular hygiene
detector. The cell is for lack of a
better word... perfect.

Munro hesitates a moment. Then he sighs and uses his personal
key to open the self-destruct box.

MUNRO
OK, go ahead! But Mr. Perfect better
be polite... otherwise I turn him
into cat food.
24.

Mactilburgh starts the operation rolling as Munro puts his
hand on the sell-destruct button, ready to use it. Thousands
of cells form in the heart of the generator, an assemblage
of DNA elements. Then the cells move down a tube, like a
fluid, and gather in an imprint of a HUMAN body. Step by
step bones are reconstructed, then the nervous and muscular
systems. Whole veins wrap around the muscles. An entire
body is reconstructing before our very eyes.

DOCTOR
Three seconds to ultra-violet
protection.

A shield comes over the reconstructing body and makes it
invisible.

MACTILBURGH
(to Munro)
...This is the crucial phase, The
reconstruction of pigment. Cells are
bombarded with slightly greasy solar
atoms which forces the body cells to
react, to protect themselves. That
means growing skin. Clever, eh?

MUNRO
(disgusted)
Wonderful!

The meter slows, drops to zero.

ASSISTANT
... End of reconstruction, beginning
of reanimation .

A whoosh of air in the glass chamber. Captain Munro has his
hand on the self-destruct button, ready to destroy the being
that has barely been reborn.

MACTILBURGH
(pushing a button)
Activate life support system.

An electrical discharge fills the glass chamber causing the
body inside to jerk.

After a few moments of silence, the SOUND of a heartbeat
fills the room over the loudspeaker.

ASSISTANT
Life support system activated.

The Supreme Being is alive once again.

MACTILBURGH
Remove the shield.
25.

The ASSISTANT automatically removes the ultra-violet shield
which slowly reveals... a woman... nude... young... and very
beautiful. Munro stands there gaping. Not quite his vision
of the Supreme Being. Mactilburgh glances at Munro and gently
pushes his hand away from the self-destruct button.

MACTILBURGH
(with a smile)
I told you ... perfect!

Munro is hypnotized by the GIRL's beauty.

MUNRO
...I'd, uh , like to get a few
pictures for the archives before she
wakes up.

Mactilburgh looks at him with a grin. A remote-control camera
approaches the girl's face, a flash goes off. Blinded by
the flash, the girl jumps and screams. She cowers in a
corner, shaking from the cold, darting eyes everywhere looking
for the case she was holding.

GIRL
(very angry)
Ouacra cocha o dayodomo binay ouacra
mo cocha ferji akba ligounai makta
keratapla. Tokemata tokemata! Seno
santonoi-aypa! Minoi ay Cheba!
Givomana seno!

MUNRO
(worried)
What's she saying?

MACTILBURGH
(to his ASSISTANT)
Activate the phonic detector.

The girl kicks the window repeatedly.

MACTILBURGH
And give her a light sedative...
and something to wear!

The ASSISTANT hits a button. A pile of clothes drops out of
a trapdoor in the ceiling. She snatches up the clothes
angrily and dresses quickly. Munro draws closer to the glass
window. He watches her dress with undisguised pleasure.

MUNRO
(to Mactilburgh)
This thing solid?

MACTILBURGH
(smiling)
An elephant couldn't crack it.
26.

The Girl finishes dressing.

GIRL
(angrily)
Teno akta chataman assin-omekta!

Munro smiles safely behind his plate glass window.

MUNRO
(with a smile)
You're gonna have to learn to
communicate better than that angel
if you want out.

Munro dangles the key on a chain that will let her out. The
girl rams her fist right through the window. She grabs the
key and yanks it. The chain snaps tight and Munro slams
into the window knocking himself out. The girl puts her
hand through the window again, unlocks the chamber and steps
out. She is still bit wobbly on her legs. Two GUARDS try
to grab her. She sends them flying across the room.
Mactilburgh is most impressed. He sets off a general alarm.

INT. CORRIDOR LABORATORY

The girl runs through a maze of corridors looking for a way
out. A squad of SECURITY GUARDS appear in front of her and
open fire without warning. The girl takes a leap, grabs an
air vent, kicks it out and dives into the air shaft. The
COPS try and jump up to the vent, but none can reach it.

CHIEF
Get me a chair or a stepladder The
rest of you go through the main
ventilation!

INT. VENTILATION DUCT - LABORATORY

The girl moves along unable to see what's ahead of her. She
comes to a dead-end, a grill that leads outside. She pushes
it out and exits onto the ledge.
Genres: ["science fiction","action"]

Summary Munro and Mactilburgh successfully reconstruct the Supreme Being, but Munro is disappointed when the being is revealed to be a young woman instead of the powerful being he expected. The girl becomes angry and breaks out of the lab, evading security guards and escaping through the air vent.
Strengths "The scene effectively builds tension and suspense as the audience wonders what the Supreme Being will look like and whether she is dangerous. The character of Munro is intriguing and his relationship with Mactilburgh adds depth. The action sequence in which the girl breaks out of the lab is well choreographed and exciting."
Weaknesses "The dialogue is somewhat lackluster and some of the characters are underdeveloped, particularly the girl. The scene also contains some gratuitous nudity that may be off-putting for some viewers."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 12 - High-Altitude Escape
EXT. LEDGE - LABORATORY - DAWN

She has exited to a ledge on the 450th floor of a building,
right in the middle of Manhattan, which we discover for the
first time. The city has become monstrous.

Buildings rise 600 stories. Cars fly. Subways run
vertically...The girl edges along the narrow ledge, unfazed
by the height. The CHIEF leans out the vent, looking out
into the void.

CHIEF
(to his men)
Go on follow her!
27.

The COPS stare into the gaping void.

COP
...No way.

The CHIEF angrily pulls out his gun and shoots at the girl
who ducks around the corner of the building. Unfortunately
the other side in full of cops as well. A flying police car
zooms up in front of her, sirens blaring.

VOICE (O.S.)
This in the police. Your status is
illegal. Please put up your hands
and follow our instructions!

The girl feels trapped. She looks down into the endless 450
below and all the cars flying underneath her. Then she raises
her arms... and dives off.

INT. POLICE CAR - NIGHT

COP
(in the car.)
Christ! She dove off!

In a panic, the COP makes a wrong turn. The girl falls for
several seconds.

She lands on the roof of a flying cab.

INT. CAB - NIGHT

Korben tries to control his car, reeling from the impact.

VOICE (O.S.)
You have just had an accident.
Seven points have been temporarily
removed...

Korben manages to stop his cab, pulls over to the side.

VOICE / KORBEN
You have one point left on your
license. Have a good day.

Korben sighs and looks in the back seat to see what the
damages are. The girl, a bit dazed (who wouldn't be), emerges
from the debris and sits up. There's some blood on her face.
Korben is stunned. The girl's still alive and... so beautiful.
His heart heads for a meltdown.

GIRL
Akina delutan, nou-shan.

KORBEN
(lost)
...'Scuse me?
28.

A police car with wailing sirens halts in front of Korben.

COP
(over a loudspeaker)
You have an unauthorized passenger
in your vehicle. We are going to
arrest her. Please leave your hands
on the wheel. Thank you for your
cooperation.

KORBEN
(obeying)
Sorry, Hon, but I only got one point
left on my license and I gotta get
to the garage!

The police car presses up against the cab. Doors slide open.
Huge guns point at her.

Korben feels lousy. The girl's helpless, there are tears in
her eyes, she looks exhausted.

Korben glances at her in the rear view mirror. She's looking
all around to find something to help her communicate with
him.

HER POV: AN AD ON THE BACK OF THE SEAT. AN 800 NUMBER TO
HELP AN ORPHANAGE. A TEARY

photo of a kid over the words Please Help. She shoots to
Korben a look of pure distress.

GIRL
(irresistible)
Please... HELP...

Korben can't resist her plea.

KORBEN
Don't put me in this position... I
can't... I'm late as it is...

But he cannot say no to her eyes.

KORBEN
Finger's gonna kill me.

Korben shuts oft the meter and floors it, sideswiping the
police car as he roars away.

VOICE (O.S.)
Your license has been revoked. Would
you please....

Korben whips out a gun and shatters the loudspeaker.
29.

KORBEN
I hate when people cry... I got no
defense...

The police car takes out after him, sirens screeching. An
insane chase ensues.

INT. NEW YORK STREETS - DAY

Korben and his flying taxi are absolute masters of the air.
The cops have trouble following him but then another cop car
comes to join in the fun. Korben drives like a man possessed,
nothing can stop him. Except the dead-end he's just come up
against.

GIRL
Daya deo dono Dato. Dalutan!

KORBEN
It there's one thing I don't need
advice on, it's how to drive.

Korben turns his cab sideways and scrapes through a narrow
passageway, ripping his taxi light from the roof. The police
car smashes into the wall. The other one brakes just in
time.

COP
Shit! Attention all-patrol cars!

The car makes a U-turn, looking for a wider passageway.

EXT. NEW YORK STREET

The police car roars up, sirens screaming then slows down
and checks out a dead-end flanked by a large vertical neon
billboard. The dead-end is empty . Korben's cab is hidden
vertically behind the billboard. Seeing nothing, the police
drive away.

KORBEN
We'll wait till things quiet down a
bit. You mind?

The girl grabs his shirt collar and pulls him close, whispers
in his ear.

GIRL
(weak)
...Priest...

KORBEN
You're not that bad... Come on we'll
get you to a doctor.

The girl hands him the handle of the case, struck with the
three Egyptian suns.
30.

GIRL
(weak)
Vito... Cor... Ni-lious... Priest...

KORBEN
Vito Cornelius?

The girl nods, then faints. Korben is somewhat lost faced
with so much mystery.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Drama"]

Summary A girl escapes from a police chase on a narrow ledge on the 450th floor of a building in a futuristic New York. She dives off the ledge and falls until she lands on the roof of a flying taxi. The taxi driver tries to get her to safety, but the police are hot on their heels.
Strengths "Intense chase scene with futuristic setting and high stakes."
Weaknesses "Lack of character development and unclear motivations for the girl and Korben."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 13 - The Fifth Element Arrives
INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

The door opens. Korben is there with the unconscious girl in
his arms.

KORBEN
(embarrassed)
Excuse me, I'm looking for a priest.

CORNELIUS
(tired)
Weddings are one floor down.
Congratulations.

Cornelius closes the door. The doorbell RINGS again.

KORBEN
She's not my bride, she's my fare.
She's looking for this Vito Cornelius.
According to the phone guide he lives
here.

CORNELIUS
(curious)
That's me. But I don't know who she
is... where did you find her?

KORBEN
She dropped in on me... holding this.

Korben hands him the metal handle with the three Egyptian
suns, stamped on it.

CORNELIUS
(staggered)
The fifth element.

He faints dead away. Korben, with the girl still in his
arms looks around helpless.

KORBEN
(sighing)
Finger's gonna kill me...

INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

In his armchair, Cornelius gets woken by a slap in the face.
31.

CORNELIUS
(with a start)
Who are you?

KORBEN
I brought the girl remember?

CORNELIUS
The girl?

Cornalius gets up. He looks at the handle.

KORBEN
Yeah! She dropped in on me. I mean
on my taxi... talking... this...
this bizarre language...

And then it dawns on Cornelius who the girl is.

CORNELIUS
(eyes riveted on her)
He's a she!

KORBEN
(bemused)
You noticed...

CORNELIUS
(face shining)
There's not a moment to lose! Wake
her up, but be gentle about it!
This woman is mankind's most precious
possession! She is... perfect!

KORBEN
So you do know her.

CORNELIUS
Uh yes, we're cousins..distant
cousins..

Cornelius runs into the next room. Korben looks at the girl,
goes to slap her, then changes his mind.

Her beauty troubles him. He hesitates, then, gently caresses
her cheek. Her skin seems so soft, so fragile.

KORBEN
Perfect...

INT. SMALL ROOM

David, is mending a cassock when Cornelius bursts into the
room out of breath.

CORNELIUS
It's a miracle!!!
32.

DAVID
(worried)
What is?

CORNELIUS
(babbling crazily)
I can't wear these clothes! This
calls for dignity! I have to dress
the part!

He opens a closet filled with identical robes and plunges
in, disappearing as David looks on, uncomprehending.

INT LIVING ROOM - CORNELIUS' APARTMENT

Korben gently kisses the girl's cheeks, but she doesn't
respond. He looks around then kisses her on the lips. The
girl's eyes snap open. When Korben straightens up he
discovers his own gun jammed under his chin.

GIRL
(angry)
Eto Akta Gamat!

KORBEN
(embarrassed)
I'm sorry, it's just that... I was
told to wake you up gently, so I
figured...

The girl pauses a moment. She stares at him, looks puzzled.

KORBEN
You're right, I was wrong! I
shouldn't have kissed you...
especially since we haven't been
introduced and...
(he pulls out a
business card)
Here, it's a bit late, but... my
name is Korben, Korben Dallas.
Keep it, you never know, maybe...
you'll need a cab one day. I'll be
happy to open the door this time!.

The girl hesitates, then snatches the card like a wild animal.

INT. SMALL ROOM

Cornelius is lost in the closet.

DAVID
Father, will you please explain what's
going on?
33.

CORNELIUS
The Supreme Being, the fifth element
is here, in our parish!!! It's a
miracle!!!
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action","Comedy"]

Summary Korben brings an unconscious girl to Vito Cornelius' apartment, looking for him. Cornelius identifies the metal handle she's carrying as the Fifth Element and faints. After a slap wakes him up, he recognizes the girl as the Fifth Element herself and plans to dress the part. Meanwhile, Korben wakes the girl up with a kiss, leading to a tense moment but ultimately introducing himself as Korben Dallas.
Strengths "This scene provides important exposition and character development."
Weaknesses "There is some awkward dialogue and the tension falls a bit flat in some moments."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 14 - Meeting Leeloo
INT. LIVING ROOM

KORBEN
...What's your name?

GIRL
(after a moment)
Leeloo Minai Lekarariba-Laminai-Tchai
Ekbat De Sebat.

KORBEN
(polite)
Hey, that's... cute... Do you have
a nickname, something a little...
shorter?

GIRL
...Leeloo.

Korben is falling in love.

KORBEN
That's... really cute...

Cornelius bursts into the room. She turns the gun on him.

He bows before her.

CORNELIUS
Appipulai Leeloo Minai..

LEELOO
Corn-i-Lius?

CORNELIUS
(bowing)
At your service.

LEELOO lowers her guard starts to laugh. An irresistible
childish laugh.

Korben smiles.

DAVID
Father. You sure she's the Supreme
Being?

CORNELIUS
Absolutely sure. There's the triple
suns on her gloves!
34.

David bows low, but his eyes glance up at Leeloo. Cornelius
begins to lead Korben toward the door, hustling him out.

KORBEN
They all like this in your family,
father?

CORNELIUS
She's an exception... Thank you so
much for your help Mr...?

KORBEN
Dallas. Korben Dallas.

Cornelius takes his arm. Leeloo stops laughing when she sees
Korben leaving.

CORNELIUS
Yes. That's fine! Thank you very
much. A thousand times over!

KORBEN
I might call to check up on her, you
know... to see if she's better?

CORNELIUS
She's fine, really..don't you worry..
just needs some rest..she's had a
very long trip.

KORBEN
I know. I was there when she arrived.

Cornelius is about to close the door. Korben's hand blocks
it.

KORBEN
Excuse me! Just one thing! She said
something to me a while ago and... I
don't really get it... Akta Gamat?

CORNELIUS
It means, "Never without my
permission".

KORBEN
That's what I thought.

Cornelius slams the door in his face.

KORBEN
...Thanks.

INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - DAY

Korben beads down the hallway. He passes his NEIGHBOR.
35.

KORBEN
Evening...

NEIGHBOR
Fuck you!

KORBEN
...Thanks... You, too.

Korben enters his-apartment.

INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - DAY

The door slides back and the cat comes rubbing up against
him, tail in the air.

KORBEN
Oh god. I forgot your food ... I'm
really sorry! How about a nice Thai
nosh to apologize? How does that
sound, huh?

The cat meows, appeased, just an the phone rings.

KORBEN
Hello?

FINGER (V.O.)
Hey bud...I'm waiting all day here.

KORBEN
Finger..man..I'm sorry..listen..I
was on the way over but I had a fare
fall into my lap.. y'know one of
those big fares you just can't
resist..

FINGER (V.O.)
(suspicious)
So, just how big was this fare?

KORBEN
5'7", green eyes... long legs...
great skin... perfect..

Korben takes out a cigarette.

FINGER (V.O.)
Uh huh..and I don't suppose you got
the name of this... perfect fare...

KORBEN
(dreamy)
Leeloo..
36.
Genres: ["sci-fi","romance"]

Summary Korben meets Leeloo, a mysterious and enchanting woman.
Strengths
  • Good character development for Korben and potential romance
  • Mystery surrounding Leeloo's character and how she fits into the larger plot
Weaknesses
  • Scene lacks significant plot development
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 15 - The Stolen Case
INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

Leeloo has a towel wrapped around her, it looks like she
just took a shower. She sits in front of a computer wolfing
down some chicken. Data scrolls by on the screen. David
watches from the corner, in awe.

DAVID
What's she doing?

CORNELIUS
Learning our history! The last 5000
years that she missed! She's been
out of circulation a while, you know.

Leeloo breaks into her childish laughter.

CORNELIUS
What're you laughing about?

LEELOO
(pronouncing badly)
Napoleon... small.

She laughs again and tosses some capsules into the microwave.

DAVID
(hesitant)
Uh father, I know she's been through
a lot... but the sacred stones..we
don't have much time..

CORNELIUS
Yes. Of course..

Leeloo takes her plate out of the microwave. A steaming
plate heaped with chicken and exotic vegetables.

CORNELIUS
Leeloo..I'm sorry to interrupt you
but..

She sits back down in front of the screen and chomps away
heavily on her second chicken. Cornelius sits opposite her.
and holds up the case handle.

CORNELIUS
(serious)
The case..with the stones... Where
is it?

LEELOO
San Agamat chay bet... envolet!

CORNELIUS
The case was stolen?
37.

Leeloo nods her head, quite unperturbed and continues to
devour the food in front of her.

CORNELIUS
(shocked)
Who in gods name would do such a
thing?

INT. CORRIDOR - ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

CLOSE ON: A pair of feet limping heavily. A MAN comes
alongside them.

RIGHT ARM
Excuse me sir, the council is worried
about the economy heating up. They
wondered if it would be possible to
fire 500...

They reach a door at the end of the corridor. Zorg enters a
code.

ZORG
Fire 1000.

RIGHT ARM
But... 500 is all they need, sir.

ZORG turns slowly. A small scar across run across his face,
his eye stutters.

This is not a man to cross, or contradict.

RIGHT ARM
1000! Fine, sir! Sorry to have
disturbed you.

The door opens...

INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

... and David enters carrying a bundle of clothes.

CORNELIUS
There was this guy with a limp who
came a month ago..said he was an art
dealer ... Asking all these questions
about the Sacred Stones..at the time
I didn't think anything of it.. What
was his name? I'm so bad with names...

DAVID
(to Leeloo, timid)
I didn't know your size.

Leeloo is happy. She pulls off the towel and stands there
nude. Cornelius and David turn away.
38.

DAVID
They really made her...

CORNELIUS
Perfect.

Leeloo finishes dressing. She is delighted.

LEELOO
(to David)
Domo danko!

David smiles, dumb with admiration. Cornelius comes over.

CORNELIUS
Leeloo? The Stones...

We must get them back.

Leeloo settles down, sits at the computer and turns it on.

LEELOO
Ikset-kiba. Me imanetaba oum dalat!

CORNELIUS
You know exactly where they are!
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action"]

Summary Cornelius interrupts Leeloo's history lesson to ask about the stolen case containing the sacred stones. David enters and they discuss the situation, while Zorg's true nature is revealed in a separate scene.
Strengths "Introduces the main plot of the stolen case and raises the stakes for the main characters. Showcases Leeloo's competency and intelligence. Zorg's character is developed through his dialogue and actions."
Weaknesses "The scene feels disconnected from the previous and following scenes. The dialogue is at times stilted and unnatural."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 16 - The Weapon Presentation
INT. WAREHOUSE - DAY

A group of handsome WARRIORS approaches. AKNOT, their leader
has the sacred case in his hands. The metal handle is missing
but the second metal glove is still grasping the case.

ZORG
(pretending to be
worried)
Aknot? Is that you?

The LEADER nods. A disgusted look stamps Zorg's features.

ZORG
...What an ugly face! Doesn't suit
you at all! Take it off...

AKNOT's face burns away revealing the head of a monstrous
MANGALORE.

ZORG
That's better! Never be ashamed of
who you are... You're warriors...
be proud...

AKNOT says nothing, but if his eyes could talk!

ZORG
So what if the Federal Army crushed
your entire race and scattered your
39.

ZORG
people to the wind... Your time for
revenge is at hand... Viola... the
ZF1.

He takes out a weapon from one a crate and goes into a sales
pitch.

ZORG
(very fast)
...It's light... the handle's
adjustable for easy carrying... good
for righties and lefties.

Meanwhile, two MEN set up a mannequin rigged with various
defense mechanisms at the far end of the warehouse.

ZORG
... Breaks down into four parts,
undetectable by X-rays.. It's the
ideal weapon for quick, discreet
interventions. A word on fire power:
Titanium recharger. 3000 round clip
with bursts of 3 to 300.

With the replay button, another Zorg innovation, it's even
easier... one shot.

He fires at the mannequin.

ZORG
... and replay sends every following
shot to the same location...

Zorg spins around, the rounds all hit the mannequin.

ZORG
(even faster)
I recharge, but the enemy has launched
a cowardly sneak attack from behind,
the automirror takes care of that.
Gives me the time to turn around and
finish the job. 300 round bursts,
then there are the Zorg oldies...

He fires off each item he names.

ZORG
...Rocket launcher. The always
efficient flame thrower... My
favorite. Our famous net launcher,
the arrow launcher, with exploding
or poisonous gas heads - very
practical. And for the grand finale,
the all-new ice-cube system!
40.

The mannequin has been blasted into a pile of ashes covered
by a net, stuck with arrows, the whole mess frozen solid. He
tosses the weapon into AKNOT's hands.

ZORG
...Four full crates, delivered right
on time! What about you, my dear
Aknot, did you bring me what I asked
you for?

AKNOT sets the case on a crate. Zorg gloats while stroking
the case.

ZORG
...Magnificent.

Zorg smiles, takes a deep breath, opens the case. It's empty

INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

Leeloo breaks into her childish laughter once again.

CORNELIUS
(astonished)
What do you mean empty?

INT. ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

AKNOT looks into the case. Things grow tense.

ZORG
Alright..I've got an open mind here..
anyone care to explain?

INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

Leeloo explains what happened in her language.

CORNELIUS
(translating)
She says that the Guardians never
really had much faith in humans.
They were afraid of being attacked.
The stones were given to someone
they could trust who took another
route. She's supposed to contact
this person in a little less than
twelve hours from now in a hotel.
She's looking for the address!

A map of the stars flashes onto the screen, Leeloo points.

LEELOO
Dot!

The little group comes over to look.
41.

DAVID
Planet Fhloston, in the Angel
constellation Cornelius plops down
into his armchair.

CORNELIUS
...We're saved!
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action"]

Summary Zorg presents a powerful weapon to a group of warriors, while AKNOT returns with an empty case, causing tension and confusion. Meanwhile, Leeloo and Cornelius decipher the message from the stones and locate the next destination.
Strengths "Fast-paced, action-packed, builds suspense and tension"
Weaknesses "Somewhat predictable, lacks emotional depth"
Critique
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Scene 17 - Zorg and Aknot make a deal
INT. ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

ZORG
I'm fucked!

Zorg calmly closes the case and gives Aknot a blood-chilling
stare.

AKNOT
You asked for a case. We brought
you a case.

ZORG
(shouting)
A case with four stones in it. Not
one! Not two or three! But four!!!
Four stones!!! What the fuck am I
supposed to do with an EMPTY case?!!

AKNOT's men grow edgy.

AKNOT
(tense)
...We are warriors, not merchants!

ZORG
(humored)
But you can still count. Look...
my fingers.

He holds up four fingers.

ZORG
...Four stones, four crates... Zero
stones...
(yelling)
ZERO CRATES!!!
(to his men)
Put everything back, we're outta
here.

AKNOT's warriors turn their weapons on Zorg.

AKNOT
(icily)
We risked our lives. I believe a
little compensation is in order.
42.

ZORG
(smiling)
So, you are a merchant, after all.
(to his men)
Leave them one crate. For the cause!

Zorg's men leave a crate and exit with the other three.

EXT. OUTSIDE ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

Zorg walks along the street to his limo. RIGHT ARM carries
the empty case.

ZORG
I don't like warriors! They're too
narrow-minded, no sublety. Worse,
they fight for hopeless causes..for
honor! Honor has killed millions of
people but hasn't saved a single
one.
(pause)
You know what -- do I like though, I
like killer. A real dyed in the
wool killer. Cold-blooded. Clean.
Methodical. Thorough. A killer,
when he picked up the ZF1, would've
immediately asked about the little
red button on the bottom of the gun.

INT. HALLWAY ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

The warriors have all taken a weapon. One of them inspects
his ZF1. He turns it over and notices the little red button.
He presses it.

EXT. OUTSIDE ZORG'S WAREHOUSE - DAY

Behind Zorg, an ear-shattering explosion levels the warehouse.

ZORG
(impassive)
Bring the priest.

INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - DAY

Korben is finishing a Thai meal, cooked by a Thai on his
mini restaurant anchored at the window. The cat eats next to
Korben, contented.

KORBEN
So you forgive me?

The cat meows just as a red light blinks, announcing the
arrival of a message in a glass tube. Korben ignores it.

THAI
Not going to open?
43.

KORBEN
I've never gotten a message that
wasn't bad news.

THAI
How someone strong like you scared
from a message? Is good news I sure!

KORBEN
The last two messages I got? The
first one was from my wife telling
me she was leaving! And the second
was from my lawyer telling me he was
leaving too... with my wife.

THAI
You right that is bad.. but
mathematically luck must change!
Grandfather say: "It never rain every
day." This is good news guarantee..
I bet you lunch!

Korben hesitates, then gives the envelope to the Thai, who
opens it with a big smile that fades as reads the contents
aloud.

THAI
...You're fired. Oh!

Korben smiles at him.

KORBEN
At least I won lunch.

THAI
Good philosophy... see good in bad...
I like... I prepare number one
dessert.. special for you and pussy..

The cat meows.

INT. CORNELIUS' APARTMENT - DAY

Leeloo is polishing of' an immense pile of dessert as David
bangs away at the computer.

DAVID
I got it! Everything here we need
to know about Fhloston Paradise
Hotel... and a detailed blueprint of
the entire hotel!

CORNELIUS
Good work, my son. Now all we need
is a way to get there.

The doorbell rings.
44.

CORNELIUS
I'll get it. Finish your work my
son.

Cornelius opens to Right Arm with armed escort.

RIGHT ARM
Father Cornelius?

CORNELIUS
My son?

RIGHT ARM
Mr. Zorg would like a word with you.

CORNELIUS
Mr. Who?
Genres: ["Action","Comedy"]

Summary Zorg is upset that the case he was given has no stones in it, and Aknot's men are edgy. Zorg manages to leave with one crate and comments on how he dislikes warriors, but loves killers as they ask about every detail. An explosion occurs as Aknot's men pressed the red button on the bottom of the gun and level the warehouse. Zorg then wants to meet with Cornelius.
Strengths "Good use of comedy in a high-stakes situation."
Weaknesses "Scene lacks a strong emotional impact."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 18 - Zorg's Office Meeting
INT. ZORG'S OFFICE

Zorg turns to Cornelius.

ZORG
Zorg. Jean-Baptiste Emmanuel Zorg...
nice to see you again

CORNELIUS
I remember you now... the so called
art dealer.

ZORG
I'm glad you got your memory back,
Father... Because you're going to
need it... Where are the stones?

CORNELIUS
...Why on earth do the stones interest
you?

ZORG
Personally, they are of no interest
to me, I'd rather sell weapons..but
I have a customer... so tell me...

CORNELIUS
Even it I did know where the stones
were I would never tell somebody
like you.

ZORG
Why? What's wrong with me?

CORNELIUS
...I'm a priest! I'm here to serve
life, All you want to do is destroy
it.
45.

ZORG
Ah, Father... You are so wrong. Let
me explain...

Zorg leads Cornelius into his inner office.

ZORG
...would you like a drink?

CORNELIUS
No thank you.

ZORG
Follow me.. Life, which you so nobly
serve, comes from destruction. Look
at this empty glass.

Zorg pushes the glass with his finger.

ZORG
Here it is... peaceful... serene...
but if it is...

Zorg pushes the glass off the table. It shatters on the
floor.

ZORG
Destroyed...

Small individual robots, both free-wheeling and integrated,
come zipping out to clean up the mess.

ZORG
...Look at all these little things...
so busy all of a sudden. Notice how
each one is useful. What a lovely
ballet, so full of form and color.
So full of..life!

CORNELIUS
They are robots!

A SERVANT comes in pours water in another glass. Zorg tosses
a cherry into it.

ZORG
Yes but... by that simple gesture of
destruction. I gave work to at least
fifty people today. The engineers,
the technicians, the mechanics. Fifty
people who will be able to feed their
children so they can grow up big and
strong. Children who will have
children of their own, adding to the
great cycle of life!

Cornelius sits in silence.
46.

ZORG
Father, by creating a little
destruction, I am, in fact,
encouraging life! So, in reality,
you and I are in the same business!

CORNELIUS
Destroying a glass is one
thing..killing people with the weapons
you produce is quite another.

ZORG
Let me reassure you Father..I will
never kill more people in my entire
life than religion has killed in the
last 2000 years.

Zorg smiles, holds up the glass and takes a drink.

Unfortunately, he chokes on the cherry. Unable to breathe,
Zorg starts to panic.

CORNELIUS
(mocking)
Where's the robot to pat your back?

Zorg falls, writhing, on his desk, inadvertently hitting
buttons which trigger a slew of little mechanisms. They pop
out all over the desk. True chaos reigns. Even a cage
appears, holding a Souliman Aktapan, a fat multicolored
beastie, PICASSO, who seems surprised to be out in daylight.
He licks his half-dead master in thanks. Cornelius gets up
and walks around the desk. Zorg motions for help.

CORNELIUS
Can I give you a hand?

Cornelius whacks him on the back. The cherry comes flying
out. Zorg regains control of himself. GUARDS come running
in.

ZORG
You saved my life... So, I'm going
to spare yours.
(to the GUARDS)
Throw him out!

The GUARDS throw Cornelius out.

CORNELIUS
You are a monster, Zorg!

ZORG
(complimented)
I know...

The GUARDS drag Cornelius out of the office.
47.

ZORG
...Torture whoever you want, the
president if you have to but I want
those Stones. You have an hour.

Right Arm salutes and hurries out of the office.

EXT. / INT. SPACE - SPACESHIP

...The dark planet. Three warships are positioned in front
of it.

Communication satellites arrive from all over the place,
drawn to it like a magnet.

CAPTAIN
(observing)
It's gobbling up all the communication
satellites in the galaxy!

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindberg appears even more crushed by recent events.

PRESIDENT
Why the hell is it eating up all
those satellites like that?

HEAD SCIENTIST
(desperate)
...We're working on it, Mr. President.
We're working on it.

PRESIDENT
It should only choke on them.

MUNRO enters the office just as a cockroach crawls onto the
desk. There's a small antenna on its back.
Genres: ["Action","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Zorg tries to convince Cornelius to give him the stones and justifies that destruction is the source of life. However, the meeting ends with Cornelius being thrown out of the office and Zorg choking on a cherry.
Strengths "Strong characterization of Zorg and Cornelius, suspenseful tone"
Weaknesses "Lengthy dialogue, predictable plot development"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 19 - The Stones Revealed
INT. SMALL ROOM

Zorg's Right Arm wears earphones, monitoring the President's
conversation with the cockroach-spy.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE - SMALL ROOM

MUNRO
I managed to contact the Mondoshawan.
They deplore the incident, but accept
our apologies.

PRESIDENT
(relieved)
And the Stones? Did you find them
in the wreckage?
48.

MUNRO
The-Stones weren't aboard the ship.

PRESIDENT
(surprised)
...What do you mean?

The President is all ears.

So is Zorg's Right Arm.

MUNRO
The Mondoshawan never fully trusted
the human race..they felt we're too
unpredictable.. so they gave up the
Stones to somebody they do trust.
Her name is Plavalaguna. She's a
Diva and she's going to sing at the
charity ball on Fhloston Paradise in
a few hours. She has the Stones
with her.

The President breathes easier.

Zorg's Right Arm is delighted.

PRESIDENT
(taking off a shoe)
Excellent!

The President crushes the cockroach with his shoe.

Right Arm's earphones fly off his head. Good-bye eardrums.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

PRESIDENT
I want your best man on this!

MUNRO
Don't worry, Sir. I have the perfect
one.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Thriller"]

Summary Munro updates the President on the Stones' whereabouts, revealing that they are with Plavalaguna and that she is going to perform at the charity ball on Fhloston Paradise.
Strengths "The dialogue is snappy and moves the plot forward. The scene also reveals important information about the Stones."
Weaknesses "The scene is relatively short and doesn't provide much in the way of character development or emotional impact."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 20 - Korben's Call to Adventure
INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - DAY

C.U. The most disgusting dessert ever made. Korben looks at
it shimmying on a plate as the Thai serves it to him proudly.

THAI
Stewed jellyfish cake... my
speciality...

Korben forces a weak, polite smile as the Thai looks on
expectantly. The phone rings.

KORBEN
Saved by the bell.
49.

Korben rises to get his cigarettes, and answer the phone.

KORBEN
...Hello?

MOTHER (V.O.)
You're the nastiest dirtbag I know
in this stinking City!

KORBEN
(resigned)
Hi Ma...

MOTHER (V.O.)
I've been playing twice a week for
20 years, 20 years I've been eating
those shitty croquettes.

Korben goes to light his cigarette. There are only two
matches left in the match box.

Korben strikes one and it fizzles.

MOTHER (V.O.)
You wouldn't even eat one to help
your poor mother, and you win the
big prize? Know something? The whole
thing makes me sick!

The Thai starts to clean up. Just as Korben goes to strike
the second match..

MOTHER (V.O.)
Are you listening to me, you ingrate!

KORBEN
(resigned)
Yes ma..

Korben sighs and puts the match back in the box.

Korben enters his code on the keypad the Thai is holding.

KORBEN
(to the Thai)
Go on... This is gonna take a while!

The Thai casts oft. Korben closes the window.

KORBEN
Other than that... You all right?

MOTHER (V.O.)
...And now you're making fun of me?
I'm warning you! If you don't take
me after all these years of sacrifice,
I'll never forgive you!!
50.

The Thai flies off. In the hall, the cat meows-for more
food.

KORBEN
(to the cat)
I'm coming!. Ma, what're you talking
about?

MOTHER (V.O.)
I get it! You want to make me beg,
is that it?

KORBEN
All I want is an explanation! I just
got in, I lost my job. I smashed my
cab. I got mugged, but other than
that everything's peachy, Ma, thanks
for asking!! Now settle down and
explain to me calmly..

A message drops in his tube. The red light goes on.

MOTHER (V.O.)
You just won a trip, you dolt!
Ten days in Fhloston Paradise for
two!

KORBEN
Ma. If I'd won, I'd know about it.
Someone would have notified me.

MOTHER (V.O.)
They've been blaring out your name
on the radio for the last hour,
blockhead!

He eyeballs the message still in the tube. The doorbell
rings.

KORBEN
Ma... it's the door. I'll call you
back.

Korben hangs up before his mother can say anything and heads
for the door. Before he gets there it opens, General Munro
enters followed by a Captain and a Major.

MAJOR ICEBORG is a woman. All she needs to become a man is a
mustache.

Munro opens a file.

MUNRO
(clipped)
Major Dallas, if our calculations
are correct you still have 57 hours
owed to the Federal Army on your
51.

MUNRO
enlistment which is more than you
will need for a mission of the utmost
importance.

KORBEN
What mission?

MUNRO
To save the world.

KORBEN
Where have I heard this song before?

MUNRO
You're to leave immediately for
Fhloston Paradise. Retrieve four
Stones from the Diva Plavalaguna.
And bring them back with the utmost
discretion as possible. Any
questions?

KORBEN
(a little bewildered)
Just one... why me?

MUNRO
Three reasons... One: As part of The
Elite Special Forces Unit of the
Federated Army you are an expert in
the use of all weapons and spacecraft
needed for this mission.

Munro pulls out a long list of documents.

MUNRO
Two: Of all the members of your unit
you were the most highly decorated.

KORBEN
And the third one?

MUNRO
You're the only one left alive...

Munro removes the message Korben hasn't bothered to look at.

MUNRO
Don't you open your messages?

KORBEN
I've had enough good news for today

MUNRO
(by rote)
You have won the annual Gemini contest
and a trip to Fhloston Paradise. For
52.

MUNRO
two. Congratulations. Here are
your tickets.

He hands Korben the tickets. Korben gets it.

KORBEN
You rigged the contest?

Munro nods.

MUNRO
Major Iceborg will accompany you...
as your wife...

The idea of taking a trip with Iceborg makes him sick.

KORBEN
(sarcastic)
You couldn't come up with something
a little more discreet?

MUNRO
Old tricks are the best tricks eh?

KORBEN
I'm not going.

MUNRO
Why not?

KORBEN
One reason... I want to stay the
only one left alive.
Genres: ["comedy","sci-fi","action"]

Summary Korben receives a call to adventure from General Munro - to retrieve four stones from a famous singer at Fhloston Paradise.
Strengths "Strong introduction to the hero's journey, good balance of comedy and action"
Weaknesses "Some dialogue and actions feel forced"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 21 - Korben's Apartment Invasion
INT. KORBEN'S HALL

Leeloo and Cornelius search for Korben's apartment. Leeloo
carries the card Korben gave her. Cornelius finds the
apartment, and yanks the. number off the door. He waves
Leeloo over as his hand goes to the bell.

INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT

The doorbell rings.

KORBEN
...Scuse me.

Korben goes to the door and looks out the peephole: the
beautiful Leeloo.

Korben panics, overcome with happiness.

KORBEN
...Shit!
53.

MUNRO
(worried)
What is it?

Korben has two seconds to make up something to get rid of
Munro.

KORBEN
It's my wife.

MUNRO
I thought you were divorced.

KORBEN
I mean my future... my ex... My future
ex... if she sees you here I'm
finished. She hates you guys. It's
what killed us in the first place.
Please...

He puts them in the fridge, shoving the jellyfish cake in
Iceborg's hands.

KORBEN
...Sorry, General, but we've got no
choice! It'll only take a minute!
Let me set up another meeting and
I'll be back.

MUNRO
Three of us will never fit in there!

KORBEN
(pushing him)
Oh, yes you will...

Korben slams the fridge door. The doorbell RINGS again.

KORBEN
...Coming!

He whips through his place in ten seconds, gathers up things
laying about, shuts drawers, rolls up his laundry in the
folding bed. He brushes his hair back and opens the door
with a big smile only to discover a gun stuck between his
eyes held by Cornelius.

LEELOO
Apipoulai!

KORBEN
I suppose that means "Hi" ?

CORNELIUS
I'm sorry to have to resort to such
methods, but we heard about your
54.

CORNELIUS
good luck on he radio and we need
the tickets to Fhloston.

KORBEN
Is that the usual way priests go on
vacation?

CORNELIUS
We're not going on vacation... we're
on a mission...

KORBEN
What kind of mission?

CORNELIUS
(sincere)
We have to save the world.

KORBEN
(skeptical)
Good luck..

CORNELIUS
Of course.

KORBEN
Father, I was in the Army for awhile
and every time they told us we were
on a mission to save the world the
only thing that changed was I lost a
lot of friends. So thanks for the
offer... but no thanks.

Cornelius is disappointed. Leeloo looks crestfallen.

KORBEN
I'm sorry...

VOICE
This is a police control action...

Everyone freezes as the whole building resounds with the
electronic voice.

INT. LANDING - KORBEN'S BUILDING

A group of POLICEMEN bursts into the hallway. One of the
cops enters a code on the police wall box. A device descends
from the ceiling, a flashing light-siren, a VOICE fills the
air.

VOICE
This is not an exercise. This is a
police control.

Cornelius starts to panic. Korben takes charge.
55.

CORNELIUS
Oh my god oh my god..

Korben pushes a button sending the fridge to the next floor.
A shower takes its place.

KORBEN
Leeloo, hide in here and don't move!

Leeloo hops in. Korben tosses Cornelius on the bed.

CORNELIUS
What are you doing?

KORBEN
Trying to save your ass so you can
save the world.

...and hits a button on the wall. The bed disappears into
the wall.

Korben grabs his tickets and slides them in his belt.
Genres: ["Science Fiction"]

Summary Korben tries to hide Leeloo from the police and Cornelius from his ex-wife while Cornelius and Leeloo try to persuade him to give them his tickets.
Strengths "Tense pacing, strong conflict, compelling concept"
Weaknesses "Slightly underdeveloped characters, some dialogue falls flat"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 22 - The Arrest
INT. LANDING - KORBEN'S BUILDING - DAY

Meanwhile, the automatic police voice continues.

VOICE
...Spread your legs and place your
hands in the yellow circles, please.

A COP slaps a viewer device on Korben's door which makes
part of it transparent.

COP 1
Put your hands in the yellow circles,
please.

Korben takes his time hiding his face. The Cop looks at his
sheet. He's looking for a... KORBEN DALLAS. He has his
picture, but it is Korben with long hair and beard.

COP 1
(to COP 2)
Sir? Are you a human?

KORBEN
No, I'm a meat popsicle.

COP 3
(at the other end of
the hall)
I found him!

C.U. Korben's calling card is clumsily stuck to the door of
the neighbor's apartment.
56.

COP 3 slaps the viewer on the nasty neighbor's door. The
neighbor is at his sink shaving instead of against the wall,
COP 1 arrives with Korben's picture.

COP 1
Sir, this is a control. Please put
your hands in the yellow circles.

The neighbor steps right up to the viewer, shaving cream on
his face. He could pass for Korben.

NEIGHBOR
Fuck you!!

INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT

Korben still has his hands to the wall.

KORBEN
Wrong answer.

SHOT O.S. EXPLOSION. Scuffle.

INT. HALL

The riot police hustle down the hall dragging the neighbor
behind them in a canvas bag.

A cop is on the wall phone.

COP
OK, we got the guy under wraps.

INT. ZORG'S OFFICE

Right Arm is on the phone, facing Zorg.

COP (O.S.)
It was not easy, but we bagged him!.
Thanks for the tip!

RIGHT ARM
(smiling)
Glad to help.

He hangs up.

RIGHT ARM
They just arrested the guy for Uranium
smuggling. Everything's going as
planned.

He shows him a plane ticket, and a passport with his picture
and Korben's name.
57.

RIGHT ARM
All I have to do now is to go to the
airport and take his place. I should
be in Fhloston in less than four
hours.

Zorg sits there quietly for a moment.

ZORG
Don't come back without the Stones.
Genres: ["Science Fiction"]

Summary Korben is being hunted down by the police and narrowly avoids being mistaken for his neighbor who was arrested for uranium smuggling. Meanwhile, Right Arm informs Zorg that everything is going as planned and he has a plan to get the stones.
Strengths "Suspenseful tone, effective use of police search, hinting at the betrayal of Right Arm."
Weaknesses "Some of the dialogue feels a bit clunky."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 23 - Shared Honey
INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT

Korben opens the shower door. Leeloo is soaking wet, her
teeth chattering from the cold.

KORBEN
I'm really sorry... there wasn't
time.

His eyes fall on an old blanket.

KORBEN
Here let me wrap you up.

Korben wraps her in an blanket and vigoroualy rubs her back.
Leeloo warms gradually and snuggles closer to that warm
comfortable shoulder. Korben's rubbing slows, looking more
like caresses.

KORBEN
...It's funny. I've met you twice
today and you've ended up in my arms
both times.

Leeloo suddenly realizes that she has maybe gone a bit too
far.

She recovers, looking embarrassed too.

LEELOO
(nicely)
Valo massa... Chacha hamas.

KORBEN
Uh..you're welcome.

The intimacy makes him nervous. He looks for a diversion.

KORBEN
Coffee! That's what you need! A
nice, hot cup of coffee!

He pushes a button on the coffee machine.

KORBEN
With some honey!
58.

KORBEN
You'll see, honey's great!...

Korben rummages through the drawer. Leeloo, innocent, doesn't
seem to quite understand everything that is going on.

KORBEN
A hot cup of coffee... with honey...

He rummages through the cupboard, exceedingly nervous. Leeloo
smiles and begins to look around. She opens a drawer and
comes upon...

KORBEN
(nervously)
I've got this great honey somewhere.
You know about honey? There used to
be these little animals who made it
with antenna...

...pictures of Major Korben Dallas War Hero.

KORBEN
...and these other animals who ate
it... one were bees the other were
bears...

She looks back to the man fumbling for honey.

KORBEN
I forget which ate it and which made
it but...

And she smiles.

KORBEN
Here it is!

Korben holds up the jar of honey.

KORBEN
Taste this...

Leeloo innocently sticks his finger in the jar then puts it
in her mouth.

KORBEN
It... melts in your mouth, doesn't
it?

She savors the honey, slowly; sensually. Her lips shine
with honey. Her eyes narrow with pleasure. Korben is
hypnotized by her lips, like a moth attracted to a flame.
He begins to lose control, which makes him nervous.
59.

An indistinct sound comes from the wall. But Korben is so
entranced with the sight of Leeloo licking her honied fingers,
he doesn't hear it until it becomes quite a racket.

KORBEN
You hear that?

LEELOO
(licking)
Cornelius...

KORBEN
Oh god!

Korben pushes the button on the wall. The bed pops out,
fully made, with Cornelius tucked in it, struggling to get
out.

KORBEN
I'm really sorry... let me help you...

Korben begins to pull at the covers when...

LEELOO
Achta ge lumitai de matala..

Korben turns..

KORBEN
What?

He turns to Leeloo struggling out of her wet clothes. His
breath is taken away by the sight of her perfect body.

Cornelius whacks him heavily on the head with a lamp. Korben
drops to the floor.

LEELOO
(displeased)
Vano da, mechteba?! Soun domo kala
chon hammas!

CORNELIUS
No, I'm not proud of myself... But
we don't have the luxury of choice.

INT. ENTRANCE - KORBEN'S BUILDING - DAY

The POLICE exit the elevator and head for the front door. A
cop suddenly takes a hit from a silencer, then a second.
Others are bashed on the head by MANGALORE warriors. One of
them picks up the prisoner bag, takes it into a small shed.

INT. SHED

Aknot, the Mangalore leader, is seriously wounded and can't
walk.
60.

AKANIT
Korben Dallas! We got him.

AKNOT
Perfect... Take command, Akanit. Go
to Fhloston and get the Stones...
If Zorg really wants them... He'll
have to negotiate. Revenge is at
hand.
Genres: ["Romance","Action","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Korben welcomes Leeloo into his apartment to get warm and offers her honey to soothe her cold. As they talk and banter, he is drawn to her sensuality. However, they are interrupted by Cornelius, who has been hiding in the bed-wall, and the police arrive to hunt Korben down, while the Mangalores plot revenge against Zorg.
Strengths "The scene has a good mix of romance, action, and comedy elements that keep it engaging. The use of honey as a metaphor, and the sensuality of Leeloo provide a strong emotional anchor. The introduction of the Mangalores and the police sets up a compelling conflict that heightens the stakes of the story."
Weaknesses "The scene might be seen as too slow-paced or disconnected from the main plot. The dialogue can at times feel a bit unnatural, especially with Leeloo's alien language. The interruptions by Cornelius and the police might feel too convenient for the plot."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 24 - Korben Takes the Mission
INT. KORBEN'S APARTMENT - KORBEN'S BUILDING - DAY

Korben gets unsteadily to his feet, some blood drips down
his face. He daubs at it.

KORBEN
Jesus!... Some priest!

The phone rings, he manages to answer.

KORBEN
Yeah?

MOTHER (V.O.)
Have you pulled yourself together?

KORBEN
...Not yet.

He hangs up.

Korben opens the fridge door. The three officers are frozen
solid. Korben grabs some ice, presses it to his forehead.

KORBEN
I'll take the mission.

He closes the door.

INT. AIRPORT HALL - DAY

Cornelius and Leeloo (still damp) arrive at the Manhattan
Intergalactic Airport.

A huge hall three quarters filled with trash piled up to the
ceiling.

There are groups of extra-terrestrials on strike standing in
trash holding picket signs. A SECURITY GUARD picks up a
phone off the wall.

SECURITY GUARD
Illegal gathering in Zone 4.

A hand taps Leeloo from behind. She whips around catching
David in the face.
61.

CORNELIUS
Leeloo, be careful.

He turns to David who in holding his bloody nose.

CORNELIUS
Did you get them?

David hands Cornelius two passports.

CORNELIUS
Excellent... Leeloo Dallas.

He hands it to her. The name makes her smile.

CORNELIUS
And Korben David Dallas.

She frowns.

LEELOO
Akta dedero ansila do mektet.

CORNELIUS
I can't pretend to be your husband...
David's in great shape.

She looks at David holding his bloody nose.

CORNELIUS
He'll protect you. Go on... See the
Diva... get the Stones... See you
at the temple... God be with you.

ANGLE ON: Korben comes rushing into the airport. Walking
quickly, he scopes the hall looking for Leeloo. A POLICE
PATROL bearing down on the STRIKERS jostles him. The cops
open fire. The strikers dive into the garbage and disappear.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Comedy"]

Summary Korben agrees to take on the mission to find the stones, while Leeloo and Cornelius arrive at the airport and get passports to travel to the temple.
Strengths "The scene sets up the next part of the story by re-introducing characters and establishing their motivations. The comedic moments help to balance out the tension of the police attacking the striking extraterrestrials."
Weaknesses "The dialogue is minimal and there is little character development in this scene."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 25 - The Dallas Contingency
INT. BOARDING GATE

David nervously puts tickets and IDs on the check-in counter.

Leeloo tosses her suitcase on the conveyor belt.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
Congratulations on winning the
contest.

David gives her a bleak smile. Leeloo rolls her eyes.

Back a ways, Korben has spotted Leeloo and... David. He
heads right for them.

Leeloo's seen him. She is both delighted and panicked.
David's seen nothing. Korben presses one of his fingers
like a gun to David's back.
62.

KORBEN
(friendly)
Hey! I really thought I was going
to miss my flight!
(to David)
Thanks, kid! You put the luggage on
the conveyor belt?

DAVID
(freaking)
Uh... yeah.

KORBEN
(smiling)
Great! Now beat it!

Paralyzed, David leaves. Korben turns to the attendant.

KORBEN
Excuse me. I was so afraid I'd miss
the flight that I sent the kid here
to pick up my boarding card.

He looks at David's fake ID.

KORBEN
...My cousin David...

Leeloo is unable to hold back a smile.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
(looking at Leeloo's
ID)
Your wife?

Korben grabs the ID and reads it.

KORBEN
Uh, yes... Newlyweds.
(aside)
You know how it is... Love at first
sight. You meet, something goes
tilt, you get married, you hardly
know each other. Right, darling?

Leeloo rips her boarding card out of the attendant's hand.

LEELOO
(sharply)
Dinoine chagantakat!

KORBEN
Took the words right out of my mouth.
Go on... I'll be right with you.
63.

KORBEN
(to Check-in Attendant)
It's our honeymoon. We're going to
use the trip to get to know each
other better.

He winks at the stewardess.

ANGLE ON:

The neighbor and a tawdry young girl cross the airport. The
couple in almost knocked over by a police patrol holding a
500 pound PIG on a stainless steel leash. The couple panics
a moment, the realize the patrol isn't for them. The pig
heads for the pile where the strikers disappeared.

COP
(to pig)
Come on, snyffer, go root!

The pig piles into the garbage. The Cop cuts it some slack.

Cornelius sits at a bar.

CORNELIUS
(to the bartender)
I feel so guilty sending her to do
the dirty work. I know she was made
to be strong but she's also so
fragile... So human. You know what
I mean?

The bartender, a robot, nods his head as he pours Cornelius
a drink.

ANGLE ON:

The nasty neighbor and his wife hand their tickets to the
check-in attendant.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
(surprised)
Dallas... Korben...

NEIGHBOR
(in a different voice)
Yes, that's me.

The check-in attendant triggers a transparent blue light
that shines on their faces, revealing two other faces:

Mangalores.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
(smiling)
Just a minute, please.
64.

She hits a silent alarm, but the Mangalores feel something
is wrong.

NEIGHBOR
We'll be right back ... we're gonna
check out the duty free...

They spin around and hurry away.

ANGLE ON:

Cornelius at the bar, half in the bag.

ROBOT
The same?

CORNELIUS
Yeah...

DAVID (V.O.)
Make that two...

Cornelius turns to David.

CORNELIUS
Where's Leeloo?

DAVID
On the plane... with Mr. Dallas...
the real one.

CORNELIUS
It's all my fault. I'm the servant...
It's my mission! Here!

He hands David the Temple Key from around his neck.

CORNELIUS
Here's the key to the Temple...
Prepare for our arrival!

Cornelius tosses David's drink into his own, downs it all in
one shot, and takes off, passing the Mangalore couple headed
for the exit. They are very nervous.

A police patrol is coming. This time, it seems to be for
them.

NEIGHBOR
(to the tawdry girl)
Tell Aknot plan A flopped. Tell him
to go to plan B.

The tawdry girl nods and peels off. The neighbor takes out a
gun and blasts away at the cops. The cops fire back. A
firefight rages in the hall. The tawdry girl dives into a
pile of garbage and disappears.
65.

COP
(into walkie-talkie)
...Send in a back-up unit, Zone 7!

ANGLE ON:

On one side of the hall, a trap door opens. Three pigs come
running out, grabbed by their police handler.

Cornelius waits until everyone has left, gets down on all
fours and crawls through the trapdoor reserved for the pigs.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Comedy"]

Summary Korben arrives at the boarding gate and pretends to be the real Dallas, Leeloo's husband. They fool the check-in attendant, who activates a silent alarm when they leave. Meanwhile, the nasty neighbor and his wife reveal their true form as Mangalores and engage in a firefight with the police.
Strengths "The comedic moments, the action-packed firefight scene, the introduction of the Mangalores as a new threat."
Weaknesses "The characterization of the secondary characters, lack of emotional depth."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 26 - Korben meets Loc Rhod
INT. FIRST CLASS LOUNGE

Leeloo stands at the buffet in the first class lounge eating
everything in sight.

INT. HALL

Korben is led down the hall by a STEWARDESS.

STEWARDESS
You are so lucky... Loc Rhod is the
coolest DJ in the universe.

KORBEN
Listen... I don't want to be
interviewed. I'd prefer to remain
anonymous.

The stewardess stops in the corridor.

STEWARDESS
Forget anonymous. You'll be doing
Loc Rhod's live show every day from
5 to 7!

KORBEN
(expression changes)
You gotta be kidding!

The stewardess smiles and shakes her head. The door next to
him suddenly swings open and smashes him in the face.

In walks LOC RHOD amidst a tornado of music and security
guards. He is young, good-looking, eccentric, charming as
an elf or sly as a fox. A bundle of energy. He is the 24th
century's most popular DJ.

LOC RHOD
(speedy, in rhythm)
Korben Dallas! Here he is The most
hated man in the universe. The one
and only winner of the Gemini
Croquette contest! Ladies, start
melting 'cause the boy's hot! Hot!
Hot! The boy is perfect..
66.

LOC RHOD
(he feels his muscles)
...The right size, right build, right
hair. Right on! Say something to
those 50 billion pair of ears out
there D-man!

An ASSISTANT hands a totally lost Korben a mike.

KORBEN
(hesitant)
...Hi.

LOC RHOD
Does it get any better or what!

Loc Rhod grabs Korben's arm and leads him down the hallway,
as fast as the music.

LOC RHOD
...Quiver ladies, he's gonna set the
world on fire right here from 5 to
7! You'll know everything there is
to know about the D-man. His dreams,
his desires, his most intimate of
intimates. And from what I'm looking
at intimate is the stud muffin's
middle name. So tell me my main
man... you nervous in the service?

KORBEN
Uh... not really.

Loc Rhod lets go of Korben's arm and grabs the Stewardess.

LOC RHOD
Freeze those knees, my chickadees,
'cause Korben is on the case with a
major face...

Loc Rhod rubs up against the stewardess.

LOC RHOD
...Start drooling, ladies! My man
here is a sharp-tongued Sire who's
gonna stroke your every desire.

They come to an intersection. The airline company has
prepared drinks for them. Loc Rhod pushes on, grabs a glass
of champagne, scribbles his autograph.

LOC RHOD
Yesterday's unknown will be tomorrow's
Prince of Fhloston Paradise, the
hotel of a thousand and one follies,
home of luxury and beauty.
67.

LOC RHOD
A magic fountain flowing with non-
stop wine, women and Bootchie Koochie
Koo...

He tosses away his champagne glass.

LOC RHOD
Beware out there puppy dogs my man
is on the prowl. Owwww!

Howling, Loc Rhod grabs another stewardess by the arm.

LOC RHOD
...And start licking your stamps
little girls, this guy's gonna have
you writing home to Momma! Tomorrow
from 5 to 7, I'll be your voice,
your tongue and I'll be hot on the
tail of the sexiest man of the year...
D-man... Your man... My man.

The stewardess shivers. A BEEP is heard.

VOCODER (O.S.)
End of transmission.

The MUSIC suddenly stops. Several assistants come and
compliment Loc Rhod who sighs, lights up a cigarette, and
drops his pretense.

LOC RHOD
Korben sweetheart do me a favor I
know this is probably the biggest
thing that ever happened to you in
your inconsequential life. But I've
got a show to do here and it's got
to pop. So tomorrow, when we're on
air, give me a hand... Try to make
believe you have more than a one
word vocabulary. OK pal?

That does it. Korben grabs him by the collar and drags him
into a corner.

Loc Rhod's feet don't touch the ground.

KORBEN
(pissed)
I didn't come here to play Dumbo on
the radio. So tomorrow between 5
and 7 give yourself a hand, that
clear pal?

LOC RHOD
(petrified)
Crystal.
68.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Comedy"]

Summary Korben is introduced to Loc Rhod, the most popular DJ of the 24th century, and is tasked with being a part of his live show. After some initial hesitation, Korben confronts Loc Rhod about not wanting to be a joke on the show.
Strengths "The scene is light-hearted and funny, with good chemistry between Korben and Loc Rhod. The introduction of a popular DJ in a futuristic setting adds an extra layer to the story."
Weaknesses "The scene is mostly filler, continuing the trend of introducing new characters and adding extraneous plot points."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 27 - Airport Standoff
INT. AIRPORT

The Check-in attendant has two more tickets in her hand.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
(alter a moment,
reading)
...Mr. Dallas... Korben Dallas?

Zorg's Right Arm gives her a big smile.

RIGHT ARM
That's right.

The attendant scans the ID with a yellow beam, it checks
out, and the blue light reveals no other face but his.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
The problem is I only have one Korben
Dallas on my list... and he's already
checked in.

Right Arm's smile shatters.

RIGHT ARM
That's impossible! He's in j... I
mean, there must be some mistake. I
have my ticket! I'm the real Korben
Dallas!

A shrill BELL rings out.

CHECK-IN ATTENDANT
(smiling)
I'm sorry, sir, boarding is finished.

The attendant hits a button. A thick window slowly slides
up between them.

Right Arm totally loses it.

RIGHT ARM
I want to see your boss! Get rid of
this fucking window! Somebody's
made a mistake, goddamnit!

He pounds on the counter with both fists. A steel curtain
comes down. Red sighting beams target spots on his body,
ten gun barrels protrude from the wall, all aimed at him.

VOICE (O.S.)
This is not an exercise. This is a
police control.

Put your hands in the nearest yellow circles...
69.

RIGHT ARM
(slowing down)
Sorry, my fault... Just a little
overexcited... that's all... I'm
calm now.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action"]

Summary Zorg's Right Arm tries to board a flight under Korben Dallas' name but is denied by the check-in attendant. He becomes agitated and violent, triggering a police control.
Strengths "The tension and sense of danger are palpable, and the scene is visually exciting."
Weaknesses "There is little character development in this scene, and the dialogue is somewhat generic."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 28 - Language and Love Lessons
INT. SHUTTLE - DAY

Korben makes his way in the plane looking for his seat. No
more seats in modern planes, just individual travel boxes
lined up like microwaves. He passes STEWARD holding his
bloodied nose. He has found what he is looking for. He enters
to.... Leeloo quietly stretched out in front of a computer
screen. Korben slips in beside her. Leeloo in concentrating
on the words that scroll rapidly past her on the screen.
He doesn't understand what she is doing.

LEELOO
Apipoulai!

KORBEN
Not hard to find you...just follow
the Chaos...

Leeloo smiles, as if complimented.

KORBEN
Leeloo, listen to me... these
tickets... they're not mine... I
mean they are, but not for vacation
like everyone thinks... I'm on an
operation... and if I didn't come
get you, you'd be in a shitload of
trouble... I'd love to be on vacation
with you... but now.... now I've
got to work... And Leeloo... I would
love to work in peace.

Leeloo types in "LOVE" on the keyboard.

LEELOO
Love...

KORBEN
Yes! But "love" isn't the operative
word here, PEACE is!

Leeloo types in this new word.

LEELOO
(rather pleased)
Peace... and love...

She brings up a picture of a 60's style Hippie flashing a
peace sign. Korben sighs and switches off the screen.
70.

KORBEN
Sometimes you can't learn everything
from a screen... sometimes it's better
to ask someone who has experience...

LEELOO
(quite happy)
What is... make Love?

Korben just stares at her for a few minutes.

KORBEN
Know what? On that subject maybe
you'd be better off asking the screen.

He turns the computer back on.

ANGLE ON:

A STEWARDESS walks up the aisle of the shuttle pushing the
red buttons on top of each individual box.

VOICE (O.S.)
...to make your flight as short and
agreeable as possible, our flight
attendants are switching on the timing
sleeper which will regulate your
sleep during the trip...

ANGLE ON:

LEELOO
(switching off the
screen)
OK! Finished!

KORBEN
Finished what?

LEELOO
Learning language.

KORBEN
Which one?

LEELOO
All 900.

Korben doesn't know if he should laugh or not.

KORBEN
You learned 900 languages in five
minutes?!

LEELOO
(pleased)
Yes! Now it's your turn!
71.

LEELOO
I learned your language, you have to
learn mine!

KORBEN
I know how to say "Hello". Teach me
how to say "Good-bye", that's all I
need.

LEELOO
Apipoussan!

KORBEN
Apipoussan?

LEELOO
Good! Do you know how we say "make
love"?

KORBEN
(fumbling)
Uh...

LEELOO
...Hoppi-hoppa.

Korben literally melts.

KORBEN
(to himself)
Help...

Luckily, a stewardess smiles at him through the box window.

STEWARDESS
Sweet dreams, Mr. Dallas!

The stewardess sets the timing sleeper. Korben and Leeloo
immediately fall asleep.

A STEWARDESS at the other end of the shuttle has a problem.

STEWARDESS 2
Mr. Loc Rhod you have to assume your
individual position.

LOC RHOD
(hugging her)
I don't want an individual position,
I want all positions!

STEWARDESS 2
(resisting somewhat)
We're going to take off soon, Mr.
Rhod!
72.

LOC RHOD
Now you're talking!

INT. COCKPIT - FHLOSTON SPACE SHUTTLE

Three CREW MEMBERS prepare for liftoff.

COPILOT
(on the radio)
Molecular axis authorization. Vector
130. Destination Fhloston.

Stewardess 1 enters the cockpit.

STEWARDESS 1
Zone 1. 217 locked. The sleep
regulator is OK.

PILOT
(checking her out)
Thanks, Miss.

The Stewardess leaves with a smile. A red light flashes on
the vast control panel.

MECHANIC
Tell the ground crew we've got
parasites in the landing gear.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Romance","Comedy"]

Summary Korben teaches Leeloo about peace while trying to convince her to come with him, while Leeloo simultaneously learns 900 languages in just five minutes. The scene ends with Korben and Leeloo falling asleep in their travel boxes but not before we see a glimpse of Mr. Loc Rhod's ridiculous and demanding personality.
Strengths "The scene successfully conveys the growing connection between Korben and Leeloo, while also building on the humorous tone of the film. The humor is balanced and effective in keeping us engaged with the story."
Weaknesses "The scene could have been shorter and still conveyed the same information. The inclusion of Mr. Loc Rhod's interaction felt unnecessary and only served to distract from the main storyline."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 29 - The Escape Plan
INT. AIRPORT LANDING STRIP - DAY

A GROUND CREW MEMBER goes over to the truck parked under one
of the plane's wings and bangs on the side of it with a shout.

GROUND CREW MEMBER
Disinfecting!

Two DISINFECTORS in hermetically sealed suits exit the truck.
They go over to the front landing gear and send up a whooshing
beam. The flame burns everything it touches. A pack of
repugnant creatures falls squealing from the landing gear.
A small trapdoor is opened under the shuttle and a huge
slightly phosphorescent tube falls out.

INT. AIRPORT HALL / ZORG'S OFFICE

Zorg's Right Arm is in a phone booth in the middle of the
hall.

RIGHT ARM
Yeah, it's me... Put Zorg on.

He is already sweating.

ZORG
(cold)
I'm listening.
73.

RIGHT ARM
The real Korben Dallas is on the
plane! He took my place.

ZORG
This is a joke, right?

INT. SHUTTLE

Loc Rhod is wrapped around a stewardess like a snake.

LOC RHOD
No!! I swear to God! I've never been
this sincere with a human before!

EXT. LANDING STRIP

TWO GROUND CREW MEMBERS stick an enormous, highly
phosphorescant tube into the opening.

GROUND CREW MEMBER
You're fueled and ready to go.

Have a nice flight.

INT. SHUTTLE

PILOT
(to copilot)
Everything ready for liftoff?

INT. CABIN

STEWARDESS
(weakly, to Loc Rhod)
No, no... I'm not ready! I'd like to
talk first...

INT. ZORG'S OFFICE / AIRPORT HALL

ZORG
I cannot hear you. We have a bad
connection here. What's your number?

Right Arm reads off the phone number.

RIGHT ARM
278-500-645-321

ZORG
I'll call you back.

EXT. LANDING STRIP

The runway is now empty. A man slips out of the shadows.
It's Cornelius. He scurries over to the front landing gear.
74.

He pauses for an instant, the climbs up the wheel well and
disappears inside the shuttle.

INT. SHUTTLE

The pilots are going through the pre-flight check list.

COPILOT
Anti static pressure?

MECHANIC
Primed.

The mechanic presses a series of buttons.

INT. CABIN

Loc Rhod undoes a series of buttons on the stewardess' blouse,
behind a curtain. He whispers a poem. Impossible to resist
him. Outside the curtain the stewardess' legs rise slowly.

EXT. LANDING STRIP

On the ground, protective fire curtains rise slowly to contain
the engine exhaust on liftoff.

INT. ZORG'S OFFICE

A keyboard slowly appears in front of Zorg.

ZORG
(typing the number)
278... 500...

SERIES OF QUICK CUTS:

The pilot gradually turns the engines up.

COPILOT
10 seconds...

PILOT
Power increase.

- The stewardess undergoes a power surge from Loc Rhod that's
about to lift her of.

- Zorg finishes gleefully typing in the number.

ZORG
3... 2... 1...

- The engines at full blast.

- The stewardess in close to screaming.
75.

PILOT
Liftoff.

- The copilot pushes a button.

- So does Zorg.

- The engines release their full power.

- The stewardess screams in ecstasy.

- In the hall, Right Arm literally explodes along with the
phone and everything else within 60 feet.

INT. FHLOSTON SPACE SHUTTLE

The stewardess' legs slowly descend and disappear behind the
curtain.

INT. COCKPIT

In the cockpit, the atmosphere loosens up.

COPILOT
(relaxing)
Landing gear secure. Let's light
one up.

INT. CABIN

Korben and Leeloo sleep soundly in their box. Leeloo has a
smile on her face and her hand in Korben's.

EXT. OUTERSPACE - NIGHT

The spaceship rockets past us, then suddenly vanishes with
amazing speed. Space is now empty and calm. Billions of
stars glow in perfect silence.

EXT. SPACE

The nefarious planet in still there, immobile, even larger
now, writhing like a serpent.

Then, suddenly, for no apparent reason, all activity stops
and it becomes gray and cold.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action","Comedy"]

Summary Korben and Leeloo hide in a box on a shuttle fleeing from danger, while Zorg's team desperately tries to reach him with unexpected consequences.
Strengths "The scene has a great mix of tension, excitement, and humor. The use of quick cuts to different locations creates an engaging pace. The conflicting motivations of the various characters make for an interesting dynamic."
Weaknesses "The scene lacks deep emotional resonance that could elevate it beyond its comedic elements. Some character motivations are not fully explored."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 30 - Shadow's Demand
INT. SPACESHIP

In the Admiral's starship, scientists watch the measuring
device. One of the devices suddenly starts working.

TECHNICIAN
All right! We're finally getting
something!
76.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The Head Scientist stands facing the President, who is looking
more tired than ever.

HEAD SCIENTIST
The thing is sending out radio
wavelengths!

PRESIDENT
What the hell does it want with radio
waves?

HEAD SCIENTIST
...Probably wants to make a call!

The President and his Generals look at him in astonishment.

INT. ZORG'S OFFICE

Picasso purrs contentedly on Zorg's lap. The phone rings.

SECRETARY (O.S.)
Mr. Shadow on the line.

Zorg shoots to his feet. Picasso tumbles to the floor.
Zorg picks up the phone, both excited and uneasy. He stands
there, almost coming to attention.

ZORG
Yes... Zorg here.

The voice is feeble. It comes from the far reaches of time,
from the bowels of the universe.

SHADOW
Am I disturbing you?

ZORG
No... not at all. Where are you?

SHADOW'S breathing is awesome.

SHADOW
...Not far, now.

ZORG
Really? Maybe I can get you on my
screen and see you at last!

Zorg brings up a huge screen and pushes a few buttons.

In the middle of an electronic snowstorm, a blackish, vaguely
human, quiverinq form appears. Two eyes, like lava, give an
idea where the head is. Zorg feels sick.
77.

SHADOW
Do you have the picture now Mr. Zorg?

ZORG
Got it.

SHADOW
How's our deal coming along?

ZORG
(ill at ease)
Fine, just fine! I'll have the 4
pieces you asked for any time now.
But it wasn't easy. My costs have
tripled.

Shadow pauses an instant. A black slimy liquid starts to
ooze from the top of the screen. Zorg is feeling worse all
the time.

SHADOW
Money is of no importance... I want
the Stones!

The black liquid oozes all over the screen which starts to
melt. Zorg sweats profusely, his legs tremble.

ZORG
The Stones will be here. I'll see to
it personally!

SHADOW
...I can't wait to be among you.

Zorg sighs and sits down totally freaked.

EXT. ORBIT - FHLOSTON PARADISE

The space shuttle fills the screen. It banks left and begins
its descent toward Fhloston, the turquoise planet. Crystal
blue water, perfect white sand beaches. A true paradise.

INT. SPACE SHUTTLE

The stewardess picks up a microphone to make an announcement.

STEWARDESS
Ladies and gentlemen, we have begun
our descent toward Fhloston
Paradise...

Stewardesses walk down the aisles waking the passengers one
by one. They press a button on the door of each box.

In the corner, Loc Rhod and the stewardess awake with a start
and straighten their clothes quickly. The stewardess is
embarrassed.
78.

STEWARDESS
(timidly)
I wanted to tell you that...

Loc Rhod puts on his sunglasses and presses a finger to her
lips. He disappears behind the curtain leaving the sighing
stewardess on her own.

EXT. FHLOSTON PARADISE

The spaceship descends through some clouds and glides over a
vast turquoise sea.

Fhloston Paradise looms into view. An enormous oceanliner
floating a dozen yards above the water. On closer inspection
it is more modern than a traditional oceanliner.

The shuttle draws near, looking ridiculously small next to
the monster. Like a sardine next to a whale.

INT. COCKPIT

A blinking light goes on.

PILOT
Shit! Parasites in Zone 1. Take a
look.

The 1st Mate heads off.

INT. CABIN

A stewardess opens Korben's box door. He is still heavy
with sleep. He looks over at Leeloo. She's not there.

EXT. FHLOSTON

The tiny space shuttle clings to the huge oceanliner.

INT. COCKPIT

The Pilot maneuvers the ship into it's docking area.

PILOT
Docking activated. You can let the
passengers out.

INT. REAR OF COCKPIT

The 1st mate pries open the door to an overhead panel.
Cornelius falls out, hanging in a jumble of wires.

INT. ENTRANCE HALL - FHLOSTON PARADISE - DAY

The enormous door opens and the passengers exit. Leeloo is
among them. She appears quite impressed by the beauty and
luxury of the 19th century decoration.
79.

INT. CABIN

Korben attempts to make his way up the shuttle's aisle.

KORBEN
(jostling everybody)
Pardon me. Excuse me. I'm trying to
reach my wife... Sorry!
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action","Thriller"]

Summary Scientists detect radio waves from an unknown source, while Zorg receives a call from Shadow who demands the four Stones, leading Zorg to panic, and the space shuttle arrives at Fhloston Paradise.
Strengths "The scene builds tension with the discovery of the unknown radio waves and Shadow's call demanding the Stones. The setting of Fhloston Paradise provides a visual spectacle and adds to the tone of the scene. Zorg's panic is relatable to the audience."
Weaknesses "The characters lack depth and development, making it difficult for the audience to connect with them. Some of the actions, such as Cornelius falling out of the overhead panel, seem contrived and forced."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 31 - Arrival at Fhloston Paradise
INT. ENTRANCE HALL

A dozen policemen wait patiently at the end of the hall.
Leeloo stops and presses against the wall. She spots Korben
leaving the shuttle. A gorgeous HOSTESS comes up to him,
drapes a lei around his neck and plants a kiss on his lips
in welcome.

HOSTESS
(smiling)
Welcome to Paradise.

Korben's face is covered in lipstick. Leeloo sees he did
nothing to stop the girl and she doesn't like it.

A HEFTY MAN wearing a sarong drapes some flowers around her
neck. Then, obviously relishing it, he leans down to kiss
her. Leeloo bashes him on the forehead. The hefty man
straightens up. He's still smiling, but his nose is bleeding.
He falls slowly to the floor.

Korben pushes forward trying to spot Leeloo. He also tries
to wipe the lipstick off.

Leeloo tries to escape through a door marked PERSONNEL ONLY,
but it's locked. A HOST looks at her with a grin.

HOST
(playful)
If you don't have the code you can't
open it!

Leeloo smiles and punches in an old code and twists the
doorknob. The door opens with the sound of a braking lock.
Leeloo smiles sweetly and enters as if nothing were amiss.

A shriek of joy fills the room. Korben turns around. The
HOSTESSES cluster around Loc Rhod as he comes out of the
plane. Loc Rhod spots Korben and latches onto his arm.
It's not going to be easy to remain discrete.

LOC RHOD
(relieved)
My main man! Please don't leave me
here alone. My head's killing me and
my adoring fans are gonna tear me
apart! Get me outta here!
80.

KORBEN
I'll take you to the bar, after that,
you're on your own.

LOC RHOD
(hanging on to Korben)
Oh, yes! Do that! You treat me right,
man. Tell me all about yourself,
your roots, your personal life, your
childhood dreams...

KORBEN
I don't think this is a good time...

LOC RHOD
...You got brothers and sisters?
What about your dad? Tell me about
your dad! What was he like?
Physically? Big, I suppose?

KORBEN
(evasive)
Yeah, very big, a giant.

LOC RHOD
I didn't have a dad... never saw
him... never even heard him. 50
billion people listen to me every
day... and he doesn't hear me...

INT. SMALL ROOM - FHLOSTON PARADISE - DAY

Leeloo is in a small room, ear at the door, listening.
Everything seems normal. She turns and discovers the room
for what it is: a rest room for... three cops who look up
from their books and stare blankly at her. Leeloo doesn't
know what to do. So she smiles.

INT. KORBEN'S STATEROOM

The door opens. The HOSTESS turns on the light and enters.
Korben follows her, gaping at all the luxury.

The BAGGAGE BOY enters bringing Leeloo's two suitcases.

Korben grabs the notice announcing Diva Plavalaguna's concert
at 5:30 in that evening.

Dress: Formal attire.

KORBEN
For the concert it says formal
attire... I didn't bring...

The hostess pulls back the closet door. Twenty tuxedos in a
row.
81.

HOSTESS
(looking him over)
Here's some champagne. I'll drop by
after the concert to open it.

She gives him a blinding smile and closes the door.

Korben pushes a button. The curtains open to reveal a most
spectacular view of the turquoise planet. Stars shoot out
into infinity. Breathtaking. Korben stands gaping.

The phone rings, snapping him out of his reverie.

KORBEN
Hello?

MOTHER (O.S.)
You little sleaze bag!

KORBEN
...Ma???

MOTHER (O.S.)
Don't you ever ask me for another
thing in my life again, you've killed
your poor mother with your own hands!

Korben drops into an armchair and sighs. His eyes go to the
ceiling.

KORBEN
...Ma!!!

INT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - POLICE OFFICE - DAY

The Chief of Police has Cornelius in front of him, handcuffed.

FOG
The Diva's ship is coming in.

CHIEF OF POLICE
I want maximum security.

FOG
Yes. Sir!

CHIEF OF POLICE
(to Cornelius)
OK, let's hear it.

CORNELIUS
Where was I?

CHIEF OF POLICE
(bored)
...You open the door. There's a cabby
with a girl in his arms.
82.

FOG opens the door. Two COPS come hobbling in all bloody
and bandaged. They hold up a THIRD COP.

CHIEF OF POLICE
What happened? A bomb go off in
your face?

BEAT-UP COP
Yeah... A 5 foot 7 inch bomb...
with green eyes.

Cornelius perks up.

CORNELIUS
And the smile of an angel?

They all turn to look at him.

CORNELIUS
(to Chief)
May I speak to you alone.
Genres: ["Action","Adventure","Comedy"]

Summary Korben and Leeloo arrive at Fhloston Paradise where Korben is greeted by a hostess and Loc Rhod latches onto him. Leeloo tries to escape through a locked door but opens it with an old code. In the meantime, Korben arranges formal attire for Diva Plavalaguna's concert and talks to his mother on the phone. Cornelius is brought before the Chief of Police for the arrival of the Diva's ship.
Strengths "Humorous moments, build-up of anticipation for the Diva's arrival"
Weaknesses "Lack of significant plot development, slow pacing"
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 32 - The Diva's Arrival
INT. CORRIDOR - FHLOSTON PARADISE - DAY

Leeloo watches the Diva's arrival. A door opens and two
POLICEMAN clear the way for DIVA PLAVALAGUNA, her MANAGER,
her BODYGUARDS and a gaggle of PORTERS carrying trunks.

Not wanting to draw attention to herself, Leeloo feigns
interest in a painting that is obviously upside down. A white
chiffon veil covers the face of the Diva, she stops in front
of Leeloo. The Diva reaches out and strokes Leeloo's face,
without touching her.

The Diva removes her hand making a sound of crackling
electricity, then passes on.

Leeloo is groggy. The Diva's ASSISTANT comes up to her.

DIVA'S ASSISTANT
Please forgive this little incident.
She wants you to know that she senses
great powers in you... in the service
of a noble cause... She will give
you what you have come to get, but
she wants to sing first... One last
time...

The Diva's assistant turns the painting right side up.

DIVA'S ASSISTANT
(nodding)
Miss.

Leeloo looks at the painting, seems to understand it better.
83.

EXT. DIVA'S SUITE

Policemen stand at attention in front of the Diva's suite.

FOG
Hello, I'm head of security.
Everything is in order. You can...

The Diva enters her suite without letting him finish.

FOG
...make yourselves at home safely.
If you need anything...give it a
knock!

INT. POLICE OFFICE - HALLWAY - NIGHT

A door opens near the police officer's main entrance.
Cornelius looks both ways. Then crosses the hall, dragging
the Chief of Police by the feet.

INT. KORBEN'S STATEROOM

Korben finishes putting on his tux, still on the phone.

KORBEN
Listen, Ma! I've only got a few
days vacation and I'll be damned if
I'm gonna spend them on the phone.

The door RINGS.

KORBEN
...Hang on, it's the door. No!
I told you I didn't bring anybody!
I'm all alone... as usual!

Korben opens the door. It's not the champagne. Even better.
It's Leeloo.

KORBEN
(to his mother)
...I'll call you back.

Leeloo heads right for her suitcase and starts to undress.
Korben has to turn away once more.

KORBEN
Here we go again...

LEELOO
(by rote)
You know women normally change five
times more than men.

KORBEN
You get that off the screen?
84.

LEELOO
Yes... you know there's a lot of
differences between men women.

KORBEN
You noticed..

LEELOO
OK, you can turn around!

Korben turns around. Leeloo has put on a very simple dress
which is sexy to the max. He is smitten. So much so that
Leeloo wonders if something isn't quite right.

KORBEN
Where you going?

LEELOO
I'm going to see the Diva sing. What's
the matter?... Do I look bad?

KORBEN
No, not at all! I mean, just the
opposite, you're... you're beautiful!

Leeloo smiles at him, his compliment pleases her. She turns,
revealing her unzippered back. Korben cannot help but stare
at her bare flesh. Her perfect bottom.

LEELOO
Do you know how this works?

Korben's blood boils. She wriggles, pressing her hands
together close to the zipper.

KORBEN
I have an idea.

But instead of pulling on the zipper he slips a bracelet on
her wrist. A flourescent beam bursts out of the bracelet
and forms a vertical bar going from the floor to the ceiling.

Stunned, Leeloo is held captive.

KORBEN
I told you I need to work in peace.
Remember? I need to concentrate.

LEELOO
And you can't concentrate with me
around?

KORBEN
It's difficult.

She tries to breakout.
85.

KORBEN
Army issue. I'm sorry.

Leeloo tries desperately to get out of the handcuffs.
Impossible.

Korben sets the radio down in front of her and turns it on.

Leeloo looks like she'd like to break his head.

LEELOO
(seething)
You're nothing but a... a...

KORBEN
The words you're looking for weren't
in the dictionary you studied. I
won't be long.

The door flies open. Loc Rhod barges in.

LOC RHOD
Hey Stud we gotta...

Then he sees the scene, Leeloo cuffed, in a low cut dress.
His mind goes to the obvious.

LOC RHOD
Korben my man what's happening here?
Who's the chick? What's the gig? We
free forming here? Getting funky
with the monkey? Can I get in on
this?

Korben grabs him by the collar..

KORBEN
No... to all of the above.

And yanks Loc Rhod out of the room. Leaving Leeloo looking
extremely unhappy.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action"]

Summary Leeloo visits the Diva to retrieve what she came for, but is stopped and told to wait for the Diva's final performance. Meanwhile, Korben prepares for the mission with his team and puts Leeloo in handcuffs to keep her out of the way. Loc Rhod barges in and tries to join in on the action.
Strengths "The tension between Leeloo and Korben adds depth and realism to their relationship. The Diva's arrival adds to the intrigue and world-building."
Weaknesses "The scene feels like a filler, with not much happening in terms of plot development."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 33 - The Concert and the Attack
INT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - OPERA - NIGHT

Loc Rhod and Korben enter what turns out to be a replica of
the Garnier Opera in Paris. A hostess escorts them to their
seats.

LOC RHOD
(broadcasting)
We have just walked into what is
probably the most beautiful concert
hall in the universe. Totally
awesome! Magnificent paintings on
the ceiling. I don't know who painted
them, but he must have busted his
balls!
86.

LOC RHOD
I see a row of former ministers,
more sinister than minister! A few
generals practicing how to sleep.
And there's Baby Ray, star of stage
and screen, drowning in a sea of
nymphets. He's not gonna get much
out of this concert, he's stone-deaf!

ANGLE ON:

Baby Ray bending his ear to a girl asking for an autograph.

BABY RAY
...to who?

LOC RHOD
(moving down the aisle)
...And over there is Roy Von Bacon,
the king of laserball and the best
paid player in the League.
(shakes hands as he
goes by)
...And over there is the Emperor
Kodar Japhet whose daughter Aachen
is still at the bar. "I love to
sing, too, but in the shower", she
recently confessed to me. She will
no doubt prove to be as generous
tonight as she always is.

A waiter gives them two glasses of champagne. Track with
the WAITER an he leaves the hall with his empty tray. He
enters a small room reserved for staff.

INT. STAFF ROOM - FHLOSTON PARADISE - NIGHT

The waiter joins some other WAITERS. They are well armed.
He opens a cupboard and pulls out a humongous weapon. Suddenly
their faces burn off revealing AKANIT, the young leader of
the Mangalores, and his troops.

AKANIT
It's showtime!

INT. CONCERT HALL

The lights dim slowly in the concert hall.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindbergh and his staff, including Munro, sit at
the desk. Speakers appear.

INT. KORBEN'S SUITE

Leeloo, still a prisoner, listens to the concert.
87.

INT. CONCERT HALL

Korben is tense. The curtain rises. The Diva, in a stunning
gown, stands in the center of the stage, head bowed. Behind
her, a star filled window. The MUSIC begins. The Diva looks
up, a rare beauty, but an alien. And then she begins to
sing. Her voice is divine, unmatched. Korben is swept up
in the TEARS.

INT. KORBEN'S SUITE

Leeloo has tears in her eyes

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

The manager couldn't care less about the concert. His main
problem is the bottle of scotch he can't seem to open. The
doorbell RINGS.

MANAGER
(ugly mood)
Yeah!?

VOICE (O.S.)
Flowers for the Diva.

MANAGER
She's allergic to flowers!!!

VOICE (O.S.)
There's champagne as well...

The manager takes one look at the stubborn bottle and opens
the door. And finds himself staring down the barrel of a
gun. A dozen Mangalores rush in. One of them, with a human
face, closes the door and waits out in the hall.

ANGLE ON:

Cornelius watching from around the corner.

CORNELIUS
...My God!

INT. CONTROL ROOM - FHLOSTON PARADISE

CAPTAIN
Commander, I have a ship with a main
malfunction. He requests permission
to dock for repairs.

COMMANDER
Did you check out his registration
number?

CAPTAIN
Everything's in order.
88.

COMMANDER
Put him in the docking garage and
inform the police.

INT. COCKPIT - ZFX200 - NIGHT

CAPTAIN (V.O.)
Permission granted. Dock 575. You
have an hour. Will that be enough
time'?

Zorg sits at the controls.

ZORG
(cold)
More than enough.

EXT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - NIGHT

The ZFX approaches Fhloston.

INT. KORBEN'S SUITE

The ship comes close enough for Leeloo to see it out the
window.

FLASHBACK:

The same ships with Mangalores at the controls attack the
Mondoshawans at the beginning of our story.

INT. KORBEN'S SUITE

Leeloo is alarmed. She has to act. She seizes the
flourescent bar beam with great effort and rams it into the
ceiling, marking a hole large enough for her to escape.

INT. CLOSET - FHLOSTON PARADISE

Cornelius bursts into the closet he left the Chief of Police
tied and gagged in. He quickly unties him.

CORNELIUS
(in a panic)
Mangalores! The Diva's suite! They
want the Sacred Stones! They must be
stopped. We must stop them! I'm
going to free you but you must promise
to help me!

The Chief of Police nods his agreement.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Thriller"]

Summary Loc Rhod and Korben attend a beautiful concert while Mangalores, disguised as waiters, assemble weapons. The Diva sings beautifully but is interrupted when the Mangalores attack her suite to retrieve the Sacred Stones. Leeloo, who is still a prisoner, sees the ship that attacked the Mondoshawans and decides to escape.
Strengths "Tense and action-packed scene with a beautiful opera contrasted with an unexpected attack."
Weaknesses "Dialogue is sparse and basic. Some character motivations are unclear."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 34 - Final Showdown
INT. DIVA'S SUITE

The Mangalores have trashed the suite. One of the Mangalores
finally finds a case engraved with the four elements.
89.

MANGALORE
I have it.

The Mangalore is about to open the case when... Leeloo
descends quietly and gracefully from the ceiling. Time stands
still.

LEELOO
(smiling)
Apipoulai!

INT. CONCERT HALL

The Diva switches from classical music to funk, picking up
the tempo.

INTERCUT:

INT. DIVA'S SUITE / CONCERT HALL

A WARRIOR whips out the biggest knife ever made and rushes
Leeloo. She disarms him gracefully. A violent fight breaks
out. The Diva sings and Leeloo dances. The Mangalores pay
a heavy price for the show.

INT. CORRIDOR

Hearing noise from inside the suite, the Mangalore by the
door gets nervous. He runs for reinforcements.

INT. POLICE STATION

Cornelius enters the police station wearing handcuffs. The
Chief of Police is behind him holding a gun.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE / CONCERT HALL

Leeloo knocks out the last Mangalore just as the Diva finishes
her song to a burst of applause. The Diva takes a bow. So
does Leeloo.

INT. ROOM

Akanit and his men listen to the concert. The Mangalore guard
runs in.

MANGALORE
They were waiting for us! It was an
ambush!

AKANIT
If it's war they want it's war they'll
get! Enact the Final Plan!

All the Mangalores cock their weapons.
90.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Leeloo is about to open the case when the door EXPLODES.
Zorg is there holding a ZF1.

ZORG
My compliments, little lady! ...And
thanks for doing all the dirty work!
I couldn't have done it any better
myself!
(sharply)
...Now hand over the Stones!

Leeloo smiles and hands him the case. Zorg arms the ZF1 and
gets ready to kill her.

ZORG
Nice knowing you.

Leeloo catches on quickly. She kicks the scotch bottle on
the floor into the gun which throws Zorg's shot off. She
jumps to the ceiling and disappears in an air vent. Furious,
Zorg fires at the ceiling.

INT. AIRSHAFT

Leeloo dodges the bullets as best as she can.

INT. SUITE

Zorg fires his 3000 round clip. The ceiling looks like a
piece of swiss cheese. Zorg sticks a small cylinder in the
wall and flicks it on. The numbers flashing by tell us it's
a bomb. The timer reads: 19 minutes and 59 seconds.

ZORG
(with a crafty smile)
You can run but you can't hide...

INT. POLICE OFFICE - FHLOSTON PARADISE - NIGHT

Cornelius is seated opposite the Chief of Police. A MEDIC
is bandaging the chief's head. The door explodes. The cop
outside in riddled with bullets. A dozen Mangalores attack
the police office. Akanit is at their head. The policemen
are caught unaware.

AKANIT
Nobody move! We're taking over this
ship!

The Chief of Police is goggle-eyed. Cornelius leans toward
him.

CORNELIUS
(pleased with himself)
I told you...
91.

INT. CORRIDOR

Zorg has the case and exits the suite just as the general
alarm goes off.

He sighs in exasperation.

INT. CONCERT HALL

Three Mangalores suddenly rush into the opera hall shooting.

MANGALORE 1
Everyone down!

There is panic all around.

LOC RHOD
(broadcasting, panic
stricken)
Ladies and gentlemen, I think we're
being... attacked. The place is
crawling with warriors.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindberg and his generals look very worried.

INT. CONCERT HALL

Some security guards open fire one of the Mangalores is hit.
The others turn their guns on the cops. People scream, diving
for cover. Korben bides his time.

More Mangalores rush in from all around shooting. Two cops
are killed.

The Diva... takes a bullet.

She falls from the stage into Korben's arms. He lowers her
to the floor. Korben ignores the panic all around and wraps
her in his dinner jacket, trying to stop the blue blood
spurting from her wounds.

EXT./ INT. SPACE - AROUND FHLOSTON

Zorg's ZFX200 speeds away from the boat. Zorg is at the
controls, a devilish smile on his lips.

ZORG
You want something done, do it
yourself!

INT. CONCERT HALL

Fighting rages all around in the concert hall, but Korben is
oblivious to it. He sets the Diva's head delicately on the
floor. Loc Rhod is hidden nearby, still on the air.
92.

LOC RHOD
(voice low, panicked)
They're hideous. They've got a crest
on the head, the eyes of a toad and
fingers all over their hands. Totally
hideous!

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE.

MUNRO
(worried)
...Mangalores!

PRESIDENT
Send a battalion out immediately!
Genres: ["Action","Science Fiction"]

Summary The Mangalores and Zorg's forces launch a coordinated attack on the concert hall, leading to a violent firefight that leaves many dead or wounded. Leeloo outsmarts Zorg and escapes, but he sets a bomb on a 20-minute timer before leaving with the stones. Meanwhile, Cornelius is arrested but is proven right about the Mangalores' intentions when they launch a full-scale attack on the police station.
Strengths "Well-written action sequences, high stakes and tension, and character development in the middle of chaos."
Weaknesses "Some of the dialogue feels cheesy or clich\u00e9, and there are some predictable plot points."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 35 - The Diva's Revelation
INT. CONCERT HALL

KORBEN
(to the Diva)
I was sent by the government to help
you.

DIVA
Don't worry. This is my fate...
How was the concert?

Korben is a little surprised, but... the Diva is an artist.

KORBEN
I've never heard anything so beautiful
in my life.

A Mangalore jumps on them from the stage. Korben makes short
work of him and grabs his gun.

DIVA
(weak)
You're a good man... She was right
to have chosen you...

KORBEN
Who?

DIVA
The Fifth Element... The Supreme
Being... Your wife...

Korben is floored.

KORBEN
Leeloo... is... she's...

DIVA
Yes, and more than that... You must
give her the Stones, she's the only
one who knows how to use them.
93.

KORBEN
(to himself, suddenly
realizing)
...So Cornelius was telling the truth!

INT. POLICE STATION

The Mangalores tie up Cornelius and the Chief of Police
together.

CORNELIUS
(to the Chief of Police)
Of course I was telling you the
truth!... If you had listened to me
in the first place, we wouldn't be
in this predicament now!

INT. CONCERT HALL

Korben wastes two more Mangalores.

DIVA
She needs you. She needs your help
and your love. She's more fragile
than she seems...

Korben looks around, ready for another attack.

KORBEN
...Yeah, so am I.

The Diva takes his hand.

DIVA
She was taught to love the life of
others... but not her own. You have
to teach her to love if you want her
to truly live!

KORBEN
(uncomfortable)
I'll help her, I promise, but I think
you should tell me where the Stones
are!

DIVA
Do you love her?

KORBEN
I... I don't know! We hardly know
each other... it takes time!

DIVA
I don't have time... I need to know.
94.

KORBEN
Listen, the last time I admitted to
a woman I loved her ... I never saw
her again.

DIVA
I would like to have died in peace...

The Diva's eyes close.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

The timer on Zorg's bomb clicks over to "15 minutes".

INT. CONCERT HALL

KORBEN
You tell me to save the world then
you go off and leave me in the shit!

He shakes her, gently slapping her cheeks.

KORBEN
Come on! You're not gonna die in
peace! You're not going to die at
all! You hear me? Where are the
Stones?

INT. SPACESHIP

Zorg sets the Sacred Case on a table in the cockpit. He
opens it with a complacent smile:

It's empty!

He cannot believe his eyes. He goes berserk, destroying
everything in sight.
Genres: ["Action","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Korben learns about Leeloo's true identity and the importance of the Stones from the Diva, who tells him that he must help and love Leeloo to teach her the value of life. Meanwhile, Zorg discovers that the Stones are missing and goes on a rampage.
Strengths "The scene has high stakes, intense action, and reveals crucial plot information."
Weaknesses "The exposition in the dialogue could be more subtle, and the character development of the Diva is limited."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 36 - The Stones
INT. CONCERT HALL

Korben slaps the Diva soundly. She comes around somewhat.

KORBEN
I'm sorry, but... the Stones...

DIVA
(very weak)
They are... with me...

The Diva dies. Blue blood streams from her mouth. Korben
frisks the Diva but doesn't find anything. The shooting
slowly stops in the theatre. The Mangalores are now in total
control.

MANGALORE 2
Stay calm and nobody will get hurt!
Hands on your head and into the hall!
95.

The guests comply.

KORBEN
(to himself)
...The Stones are with me?

And then it occurs to him.

KORBEN
...In me?

He touches the Diva's stomach and senses something hard.
Girding himself, he sticks his hand in the wound and pulls
out a Sacred Stone. Then another. And another.

Korben pulls out all four Stones, covered in blue blood.
Everyone has left the theater.

The Mangalores check the aisles one by one.

Loc Rhod peeks out from under a seat.

LOC RHOD
Don't you think we'd better be going?

A Mangalore spots Korben kneeling alongside the Diva. He
grabs Korben by the shoulder and pokes him with his gun.

MANGALORE
Hey, you! With the others!

Korben spins and, in one swift motion, breaks his arm. Just
for starters. Another WARRIOR rushes over. Korben punches
him into oblivion and snatches the gun.

KORBEN
That's it... I've had... all day
people have been sticking guns in my
face...

Korben wraps up the four Stones in his shirt.

LOC RHOD
Korben man... These dudes are going
to waste us if we don't do what they
say.

Korben gives him the package and grabs his mike.

KORBEN
You don't do what I say... I'll waste
you myself. Got it?

LOC RHOD
Got it...
96.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindberg dabs his sweaty face with a towel.

INT. POLICE STATION

Akanit is still in the police station facing control screens.
He barks into a walkie-talkie.

AKANIT
What's the situation in the hall?
Genres: ["sci-fi","action"]

Summary Korben retrieves the Sacred Stones from the Diva's body amidst the chaos of the Mangalores taking control of the concert hall.
Strengths "The scene is intense and action-packed, with a clear objective for the characters. Korben's fighting skills are highlighted, and the Sacred Stones continue to be a central plot point."
Weaknesses "The scene is fairly straightforward and serves primarily as a plot device to move the action forward."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 37 - Battle in the Hallway
INT. HALL

Hostages are being gathered in the middle of the hall. They
are surrounded by Mangalores who guard them.

MUGGER
(into walkie-talkie)
There's no more resistance.
Everything's under control.

Three Mangalores are suddenly blasted through the glass door
leading to the theater. Korben bursts into the hall, two
huge guns in his hands.

KORBEN
Everybody down!

Korben takes out two more WARRIORS coming towards him, rolls
behind a column.

Laser bullets stinging all around his head.

LOC RHOD
This is amazing! Korben, Korben
Dallas, the winner of the Gemini
Croquette contest just killed three
warriors like he was swatting flies...
Panic everywhere! Heavy firing fills
the hall.

ANGLE ON:

Roy von Bacon, the laserball player, rises from the floor
behind a Mangalore, grabs him and smashes his head into a
column, seizing the gun.

ANGLE ON:

Two Mangalores firing a huge machine gun at the column Korben
is using for cover.

He dives for cover behind the bar.
97.

ANGLE ON:

Two Mangalores watch awestruck. Roy whistles behind them.
The two Mangalores turn around. Roy bonks their heads
together.

LOC RHOD
It's Roy von Bacon, the Lions center
forward joining in the battle...

Someone taps Loc Rhod on the shoulder. He jumps with fright.

PRINCESS AACHEN
(hot to trot)
All this is terribly exciting, hmmm?

Loc Rhod covers his mike.

LOC RHOD
GET OFF MY BACK!

A Mangalore shoots in their direction. Loc Rhod flattens
himself on the floor. A vase falls on the Princess knocking
her out. A Mangalore loads some missiles in his gun and
destroys the bar piece by piece forcing Korben to move
forward. Korben motions to Baby Ray hiding under the pool
table.

KORBEN
Toss me the balls!

BABY RAY
(terrified, still
deaf)
What?

Another piece of the bar explodes.

KORBEN
The balls for Christ's sake!

Korben apes playing pool, but Baby Ray really is stone-deaf.

EMPEROR JAPHET
He wants the balls! You deaf or
something?

The EMPEROR rolls the balls over to Korben. The Mangalore
loads more missiles and shatters another part of the bar.
Korben hides behind the last bit left.

KORBEN
How far is he from here?

The EMPEROR glances at the Mangalore, who in reloading.
98.

EMPEROR
I'd say about thirty yards to the
left.

Korben hefts the ball, jumps up and hurls it with blinding
speed. The Mangalore catches it right in the head. He drops,
firing in the air. The missile strikes the ceiling which
collapses on him. The emperor gives Korben a thumb's up.

LOC RHOD
...And our man Korben has literally
knocked out the opposition with an
amazing 90 foot pitch.

The COPS on the floor rise, scoop up weapons from dead
Mangalores and lay down a line of fire at the last of the
fleeing rebels . Roy whirls his arm in victory.

FOG
Thanks for your help.

KORBEN
Forget it.

Korben grabs Loc Rhod and takes him with him.

INT. KORBEN'S SUITE

Korben bursts into the room. He stares at the luminous bar
still struck to the ground and sees the hole Leeloo escaped
through.

KORBEN
Leeloo???

INT. DIVA'S SUITE - CEILING

Leeloo in bleeding all over. She can barely move.

LEELOO
(feeble)
Kor... ban...

EXT. NEAR FHLOSTON

The ZFX 200 speeds back toward Fhloston Paradise.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

The bomb timer now reads 10 minutes.

INT. POLICE STATION HALLWAY - FHLOSTON PARADISE

The last of the Mangalores have barricaded themselves in the
back of the station and shoot at anything that tries to enter.
Korben joins the policemen already there.
99.

COP 1
Hey, who are you?

KORBEN
The winner of the Gemini Croquette
contest.

Korben goes to the door and peeks around the corner. Loc
Rhod arrives.

KORBEN
Seven to the left. Five to the right.

COP
What's he doing?

Korben leans around the corner and fires rapidly.

KORBEN
Six to the left. One to the right.

LOC RHOD
He's on vacation.

KORBEN
(reloading)
We got to find the leader. Mangalores
don't fight without a leader.

INT. POLICE STATION

Akanit gets up, grabs Cornelius by the throat and put a gun
to his head.

AKANIT
One more shot and we start killing
hostages, got that?
Genres: ["action","sci-fi"]

Summary Korben and Roy join the battle against the Mangalores in the hallway, while Loc Rhod provides live commentary. The Princess gets knocked out, and Leeloo is found bleeding in the Diva's suite. Korben and the police try to find the Mangalore leader before they start killing hostages.
Strengths "Intense action sequences, good use of set pieces and props, comedic moments interspersed throughout the scene."
Weaknesses "Some of the dialogue feels a bit on the nose, and there are some stereotypical characterizations of the Mangalores."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 38 - Negotiation Gone Wrong
INT. POLICE STATION HALLWAY

KORBEN
Found him...

AKANIT
(tense)
Send someone to negotiate!

KORBEN
Mind if I go? I'm an excellent
negotiator.

COP 1
Uh... Sure, go ahead.

Korben gets ready.
100.

COP 1
We're sending someone in who's
authorized to negotiate.

INT. POLICE STATION

Korben walks quickly into the room, heads straight for Akanit,
raises his gun and puts a bullet through his head.

KORBEN
Anyone else want to negotiate?

COP 2
(to another Cop)
Where'd he learn to negotiate like
that?

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

MUNRO
From us!

The President gives Munro a hard look.

INT. CONTROL ROOM

The police round up the remaining Mangalores. Korben is at
the control center screens trying to find Leeloo. Cornelius
comes over to him, embarrassed.

CORNELIUS
You're probably very angry with me
and I quite understand. But I want
you to know I'm fighting for a noble
cause.

KORBEN
Yeah, I know... to save the world...
but right now all I want to do is
save Leeloo.

CORNELIUS
Leeloo's in trouble?

KORBEN
When is she not in trouble?

CORNELIUS
Uh.. Have you tried the Diva's suite?

Korben realizes that Cornelius in probably right.

INT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - LANDING DOCK AND GARAGE

The ZFX200 settles in the landing dock garage. SECURITY
POLICE approach the ship just as Zorg in getting out holding
the ZF1.
101.

POLICEMAN
More trouble?

ZORG
Nothing I can't fix myself.

He brings up the ZF1 and wipes out the garage.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Korben enters the Diva's suite which is in shambles. He
looks everywhere, but finds nothing.

INT. AIRSHAFT

Leeloo lies in a pool of blood. She hears something below
her.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Exhausted, Loc Rhod wipes his forehead and finds himself
face to face with the bomb stuck on the wall.

Korben in busy looking for Leeloo.

KORBEN
(loudly)
Leeloo?

Up in the airshaft, Leeloo has heard him.

LEELOO
Korben...

Her voice is too weak, Korben can't hear her.

LOC RHOD
Korben man... what the hell is this?

Korben gives the bomb a prefunctory glance.

KORBEN
A molecular bomb. Three minutes
left on the timer.

LOC RHOD
(increasingly worried)
And, uh, what're these numbers
clicking by?

CORNELIUS
Probably the time remaining before
it explodes.

Cornelius smiles and continues his search.
102.

LOC RHOD
(weak smile)
You're just saying that to scare me!
Right? If it was a bomb, an alarm
would've gone off. There's bomb
detectors in all these hotels!

A general alarm goes off. Loc Rhod is crushed.

INT. MAIN HALL

The lights flicker.

VOICE (O.S.)
This is a Type A alert. For security
reasons the hotel must be evacuated.
Please proceed calmly to the lifeboats
located in the main hallways.

A wave of panic engulfs the hall. The cops are unable to
hold back the crowd as it stampedes to the exits.

INT. CORRIDOR

Zorg marches down the corridor shooting everyone in his path.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Loc Rhod stands paralyzed in front of the flashing timer.
Less than two minutes left.

LOC RHOD
Maybe we oughta be going, what do
you think?

KORBEN
Not without Leeloo.

Loc Rhod cannot take his eyes off the bomb.

LOC RHOD
Like D-Man, I hate to bother you but
uh, like, we're down to 2 minutes
here...

Korben breathes out, bothered. He turns his attention to
the bomb.

KORBEN
It's the latest model.. I've never
seen one before... it works off a
magnetic coded card... Let's see if
I can rig it up.
103.
Genres: ["Action","Sci-Fi","Thriller"]

Summary Korben enters the room with Akanit to negotiate but ends up killing him instead. The police round up the remaining Mangalores and try to find Leeloo while running into trouble with Zorg. Meanwhile, a molecular bomb is discovered in the Diva's suite, causing panic and chaos.
Strengths "The action and intense scenes keep the audience on the edge of their seats. The concept of a molecular bomb adds an extra layer of tension to the scene."
Weaknesses "The dialogue could be more memorable and impactful. The theme could use more development and depth."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 39 - The Final Battle
INT. AIRSHAFT

Leeloo sticks her fingers out one of the bullet holes and
lets some of her blood drip down.

The blood splats on Korben's hand. He snaps his head up and
knows immediately who is up there. He forgets about the
bomb.

LOC RHOD
Hey! What are you doing? The bomb!

Korben drags the desk over, jumps on it and pokes his head
in the torn up airshaft He spots Leeloo who gives him a weak
smile.

KORBEN
Don't worry, I'm here now!

He pulls her toward him, helps her out of the shaft and
stretches her out on the desk.

KORBEN
Just relax. I've got the Stones.
Everything's going to be fine.

30 seconds left on the timer.

LOC RHOD
(falling to pieces)
Like Korben, can I have 30 seconds
of your time here?

KORBEN
(to Leeloo)
I'll be right back.

Korben dashes over to the bomb. He is stopped by the barrel
of the ZF1. Zorg, in person, holding a magnetic card.

ZORG
(smiling)
Allow me...

Zorg slips a small magnetic card in the bomb, it starts to
count down from 5 minutes.

ZORG
Just for the fun of it.

Loc Rhod faints.

ZORG
Well, what do we have here? Is this
Korben Dallas? The famous winner of
the Gemini Croquette contest?
104.

ZORG
Or is this Korben Dallas from Special
Section sent by old Lindberg himself.

Korben doesn't reply.

ZORG
...In any event, whoever you are, I
was glad to meet you.

Zorg fires at Korben who figures he is dead. Nothing. Zorg
tries again. Nada. The clip is empty. Zorg starts to panic.

ZORG
...A 3000 round clip! I didn't fire
off 3000 rounds... did I?

KORBEN
Don't you know how to count. It's
not all that hard. Watch!

Korben punches him square in the face, shows him his index.

KORBEN
One! That's for trying to kill me!

Second Punch.

KORBEN
Two! That's for firing me! Three!
That's for pushing around a priest!
And the rest is for what you did to
my wife!

Korben pummels him mercilessly.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindberg prefers closing his eyes. Munro's
shoulders move as if he were beating on Zorg.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Zorg falls to the floor, beaten to a pulp. The timer clicks
over to 3 minutes.

KORBEN
We're outta here!

He picks Leeloo up in his arms.

Cornelius grabs Loc Rhod and gives him a resounding slap.

LOC RHOD
Are you nuts, Father? That hurts! I
can't feel my teeth.
105.

CORNELIUS
Doesn't matter all you need are your
legs.

EXT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - NIGHT

The lifeboats launch from the hotel and fly out into space.

INT. FHLOSTON PARADISE - LANDING DOCK GARAGE

Korben, carrying Leeloo, Cornelius and Loc Rhod are in the
garage.

VOICE (O.S.)
Two minutes to complete evacuation...

Korben bursts the lock on the first ship he finds and enters
followed by Cornelius and Loc Rhod. The ZFX200.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Zorg starts to come around.

INT. ZFX

Korben sets Leeloo down.

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Zorg picks up his ZF1, unaware of the bomb and the countdown.

ZORG
I didn't fire three thousand rounds...

INT. ZFX2O0 COCKPIT

VOICE (O.S.)
One minute to total evacuation...

LOC RHOD
You know how to fly this thing?

KORBEN
(concentrating)
It's like a cab isn't it?

VOICE
30 seconds...

KORBEN
Anyone know how to release the lines
on this crate?

INT. DIVA'S SUITE

Zorg is busy with the ZF1 when the bomb starts to BEEP
signaling the last ten seconds.
106.

Zorg is terror stricken. He pushes a button and holds the
ZF1 over his head.

ZORG
(loudly)
Maximum Protection.

A mauve-colored magnetic shield closes around Zorg like an
indestructible sarcophagus.
Genres: ["Action","Sci-Fi"]

Summary Korben fights Zorg to save Leeloo and escape from Fhloston Paradise before the bomb goes off
Strengths "The action-packed fight scene and escape from Fhloston Paradise are gripping and exciting."
Weaknesses "The dialogue in this scene is not particularly memorable or impactful."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 40 - Escape and Explosion
INT. ZFX200 COCKPIT

Cornelius and Loc Rhod are bent over the buttons looking for
a way to release the lines.

VOICE (O.S.)
6... 5...

KORBEN
Found it?

Loc Rhod searches frantically.

LOC RHOD
I don't even know what I'm looking
for!

KORBEN
Fuck it! Hold tight!

Korben slams the throttle into full forward. The ship roars
away ripping the lines to shreds.

Loc Rhod is thrown to the rear of the ship.

CUT TO:

The counter goes 1... 0

- The suite disintegrates - The corridor is consumed.

- The main hall is no more.

EXT. FHLOSTON PARADISE

The ZFX200 jets away as the enormous oceanliner explodes
behind it.

INT. ZFX

The ship stops shaking. That was a close one. Everyone's
relieved.

KORBEN
Solid little jobs, aren't they?
107.

LOC RHOD
(broadcasting,
exhausted)
Dear listeners, your favorite DJ is
alive and kicking. It's seven o'clock
and time for the news. Tune in
tomorrow for another adventure.

VOCODER (O.S.)
Beep. End of transmission.

Loc Rhod lets out a huge sigh.

LOC RHOD
(to the others)
The best show I ever did!

EXT. PLANET FHLOSTON

A magnetic sarcophagus crosses the Fhloston sky and crashes
into a glacier.

EXT. FHLOSTON

Zorg appears in the middle of the ice. He takes a portable
phone out of the ZF1.

ZORG
How's that? Can you hear me better
now?

SECRETARY (O.S.)
Yes, Mr. Zorg, I hear you perfectly!
So, how was the concert?

ZORG
Who gives a shit! I didn't come
here to listen to music! Listen up
instead of running off at the mouth!
The batteries on my phone are almost
gone.

SECRETARY (O.S.)
Yes, Sir!

ZORG
Dispatch me another ZFX200
immediately. Someone stole mine.

SECRETARY (O.S.)
Right away, Sir. I'll send you a new
one to the hotel.

ZORG
I'm not at the hotel! Hello?...
108.

BEEPER (O.S.)
Battery dead.

Zorg is all alone, lost, in the middle of the glacier.

ZORG
(to himself)
Stay calm.... stay calm...

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

General Munro enters the office with a smile.

MUNRO
Major Dallas has the Five Elements
on board. The priest is guiding them
directly to the temple.

President Lindberg closes his eyes in relief.

PRESIDENT
Thank God! We've been saved!

A SCIENTIST rushes in.

SCIENTIST
Mr. President.

PRESIDENT
Yes? Now, what?

EXT. SPACE

A ball of fire, all-powerful Evil, speeds across the screen
with three Federal Army warships following along behind it
as best they can.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

PRESIDENT
What do you mean, "it's advancing"?!

INT. COCKPIT - FEDERATED WARSHIP

COMMANDER
It's not only advancing, but it's
moving at incredible speed! We're
having trouble following it.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

PRESIDENT
(to Scientist)
...And... Do you have any idea where
it's heading?

The scientist is hard to put to answer, he shakes his head.
109.

INT. ZFX200 COCKPIT - NIGHT

Korben gently wipes Leeloo's forehead with a cloth. She
opens her eyes a little.

KORBEN
(gentle, loving)
Apipoulai..

Leeloo smiles, weakly, feverish.

LEELOO
I'm so very sad.

KORBEN
Why? We did pretty well, wouldn't
you say?

LEELOO
Five hundred wars... Arms... Drugs...
Money... Everything you create is
used to destroy...

KORBEN
I told you not to read all that crap!

LEELOO
Protect life... Until death.

Her eyes close and she falls back asleep. Korben is worried.
She seems so depressed.

Cornelius enters.

CORNELIUS
There's a General on the phone...
His name's Mambo, I think.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Adventure"]

Summary Korben and his team manage to escape the Fhloston Paradise just as it explodes behind them, while simultaneously Zorg tries to replace the ZFX200 that was stolen from him. The President learns that an all-powerful evil force is advancing, and Korben tends to a depressed Leeloo.
Strengths "The blend of action, sci-fi, and adventure genres keep the audience engaged, while the touching moment between Leeloo and Korben adds an emotional depth to the scene."
Weaknesses "The scene jumps back and forth between different characters and settings, which may confuse or disorient the audience."
Critique
Suggestions



Scene 41 - Race Against Time
INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

MUNRO
Munro here. President Lindberg wants
to talk to you. Hold the line.

The President clears his throat and takes the phone.

PRESIDENT
Major, first off, I want to thank
you, in my name and in the name of
the Federation...

INT. ZFX200 / PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

PRESIDENT (O.S.)
For the praiseworthy courage you
have shown us!
110.

PRESIDENT (O.S.)
I'd like to congratulate General
Munro for his choice. He found the
ideal man for such a...

KORBEN
(to the point)
So now what's the problem?

The President drops into his armchair and sighs.

PRESIDENT
There's a ball of fire 1,200 miles
in diameter heading straight for the
earth. And we have no idea how to
stop it! ...That's the problem.

Korben thinks fast. The Priest is with him. The Five
Elements are on board.

KORBEN
How much time before the collision?

The President queries the scientist with a nod of the head.

SCIENTIST
If its speed remains constant... in
an hour and 57 minutes.

KORBEN (O.S.)
I'll call you back in two hours.

Korben hangs up. The President looks stunned.

EXT. SPACE

The ZFX200 shifts to the speed of light and vanishes in the
star-studded cosmos.

INT. CHAPEL

David is asleep. He is woken by the sound of...

EXT. DESERT - DAWN

The ZFX200 is parked in the middle of the desert.

Korben walks ahead carrying Leeloo. Cornelius has the four
Stones with him.

Barely awake, Loc Rhod stumbles along. David appears at the
door of the chapel.

DAVID
You're all safe. Thanks be to God!
111.

CORNELIUS
Later, David! Later! There's not a
minute to lose!

The small group enters the chapel.

INT. CHAPEL

Cornelius pushes the group onto the altar which is surrounded
by a wooden barrier.

Cornelius stands in front of the cross.

KORBEN
Excuse me, Father, but... could we
pray later?

Cornelius bends the cross and pushes it down. A mechanism
is set off lowering the altar like a service elevator.

The altar descends amid rocky walls.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

MUNRO
They just landed in the desert.

PRESIDENT
(sweating)
How much time is left?

EXT. SPACE

Earth is in view. The Dark Planet fills the screen and heads
for the blue planet.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

SCIENTIST
About nine minutes.

President Lindberg has trouble breathing.

INT. TEMPLE

Lit by torches, Korben sets Leeloo delicately on the altar
in the exact center of the four elements. Cornelius looks
over the four Stones every which way.

CORNELIUS
(panic-stricken)
Uh, this one... must be water!

It's obvious he doesn't know where to put it.
112.

KORBEN
Don't tell me you don't know how all
this works?

CORNELIUS
Theoretically, yes! The four Stones
form the beam and the Fifth Element
is supposed to stand in the middle
there, but... I don't have the
reference book. I've never seen the
Stones work!

Korben can't believe his ears. He tears the Stone out of
Cornelius' hand and studies the inscriptions. He goes over
to one of the four bases the stones rest on and tries to
figure it out. The symbol of air is on the Stone, the same
as on the base.

KORBEN
Match the symbols!

Korben places the first Stone and picks up another one.
Cornelius has found the symbol for water. Loc Rhod sits
down. He is very tired.

LOC RHOD
What is this some kinda game? Like
chess?

Korben pulls him to his feet and sticks a Stone in his hands.

KORBEN
No. It's much simpler. If we don't
figure out where these Stones go in
five minutes, we're all dead! Think
you got it?

Loc Rhod's got it and runs over to put in his Stone. The
four Stones are all in place but nothing happens.

KORBEN
There's no light! You told me there
were supposed to be four beams of
light.

CORNELIUS
(lost)
Yes, of course, but... The Stones
are shut! They have to be open for
it to work.

KORBEN
And you don't know how they open, is
that what you are saying?

CORNELIUS
That's what I'm saying.
113.

EXT. SPACE

The Dark Planet closes in on Earth rapidly.
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Action"]

Summary Korben and his team hurry to stop a massive ball of fire heading towards Earth while desperately trying to figure out how to activate the stones they need to save the planet.
Strengths "The scene maintains a sense of urgency and incorporates themes of teamwork, problem-solving, and sacrifice. The stakes are high and the conflict is palpable as the characters race against time to save the world."
Weaknesses "The dialogue is somewhat lacking in character development and could benefit from more emotional depth. The scene is also heavily reliant on previously established plot elements, making it difficult for those unfamiliar with the story to fully grasp the significance of the events taking place."
Critique
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Scene 42 - The Stones
INT. CHAPEL

Korben leans over Leeloo.

KORBEN
Leeloo? The Stones! We have to open
them! How does it work?

LEELOO
(feeble)
The wind blows... the fire burns...

KORBEN
I know all that, Leeloo! I'm talking
about the Stones.

LEELOO
...The rain falls...

Korben is desperate. Leeloo's too weak, he won't get anything
more out of her.

He darts over to a Stone and turns it over and over.

KORBEN
The rain falls... the wind blows?

Loc Rhod stands in front of his Stone looking at Korben.

KORBEN
Try and figure out how this fucking
thing opens, instead of staring at
me like that!

Loc Rhod starts feeling the Stone all around.

LOC RHOD
(afraid)
I'm looking, I'm looking.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The tension is palpable in the President's office.

SCIENTIST
...Three minutes.

MUNRO
We've lost contact with them.
114.

INT. CHAPEL

Korben and Cornelius turn the Stones every which way. All
to no avai1. Loc Rhod is discouraged.

LOC RHOD
...we'll never make it.

He sighs. Three hooks pop off the Stone. Loc Rhod can't
believe his eyes.

LOC RHOD
It... it moved! Korben! Korben!

Korben rushes over, looks at the Stone. Hooks are undone.

KORBEN
What did you say? What did you do?

LOC RHOD
Nothing! Swear to God, I didn't do
nothing!

KORBEN
Look, you did something that set it
off. Try to remember. Concentrate.
Tell me exactly what you did!!

Loc Rhod tries to duplicate the same movement.

LOC RHOD
I was like this... With my hands
here and... I said, "We'll never
make it!" That's all!

Nothing happens.

KORBEN
Is that all?

LOC RHOD
Yeah... then I sighed... like this.

Loc Rhod sighs, really depressed this time. The Stone opens
even more.

Korben's got it.

KORBEN
The wind! The wind blows...

Korben blows on the Stone which immediately opens revealing
a patch of blue sky with some miniature clouds floating around
inside. A yellow beam pops up like a ray of sunlight, like
Korben's smile.
115.

KORBEN
Quickly, everyone on a Stone!
Water for water! Fire for fire!
Earth for earth!

The two men move fast. Korben on the 4th Stone: Earth. He
grabs a fistful of earth and throws it on the Stone. A
miniature patch of green appears and immediately forms a
green beam. Cornelius wipes his forehead with a scarf and
wrings it out over the Stone. It opens revealing a patch of
miniature raging sea. A blue beam appears.

Loc Rhod has a problem.

LOC RHOD
(shaking)
I don't have a light. I stopped
smoking last week! If we'd come a
bit sooner...

Korben pats his pockets, he comes up with a box of matches.
There's only one left.

KORBEN
Don't breathe.

Loc Rhod and Cornelius hold their breath. Korben strikes
the match. A small flame appears on the tip. A breeze goes
through the room. Korben feels like he's got TNT in his
hands. He approaches the flame to the Stone. The flame
twists, dims, flickers ...but holds on. The Stone opens. A
patch of miniature fire appears. Korben sighs, snuffs out
the match. The fourth beam, a red one, immediately forms.

EXT. SPACE

A mass of fire fills the screen. The Earth is only a thousand
miles away.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

SCIENTIST
Two more minutes.

The President shuts his eyes. His lids move in prayer.

INT. CHAPEL

Korben helps Leeloo onto her feet where the four beams and
four colors crisscross.

KORBEN
It's up to you now, Angel!

LEELOO
I'm so tired...
116.

KORBEN
You can sleep tomorrow... come on...

LEELOO
I want to sleep... forever...

KORBEN
Leeloo! Listen to me! I'll take you
on a vacation afterwards! A real
vacation, this time, for as long as
you want. Come on! You can do it!

Korben slowly releases Leeloo and steps back from the altar.

Leeloo can barely stand in the center of the four beams.

An indistinct white beam begins to form around her, starts
to rise.

CORNELIUS
Come on Leeloo! Come on!

The beam loses its intensity. Leeloo crumples to the floor.

EXT. SPACE

The Dark Planet hurtles toward Earth. A hundred miles before
impact. The African continent is visible. No doubt about
it:

The fireball is heading right for Egypt.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Action","Adventure"]

Summary Korben and his team try to figure out how to open the Stones. Meanwhile, the President and his team anxiously wait for them to succeed while the Dark Planet approaches Earth.
Strengths "Tense and exciting scene full of action and adventure."
Weaknesses "Dialogue could be stronger and more impactful."
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Scene 43 - The Kiss of Life
INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

Seconds tick away relentlessly on the scientist's stopwatch.

SCIENTIST
It'll be entering the atmosphere in
one minute.

INT. CHAPEL

The heat in the temple is unbearable. All the walls start
to ooze the same horrible black slimy liquid seen at Zorg's.
A drop of liquid falls to the temple floor and begins to
smoke, eating away at it like acid. Loc Rhod has to dodge
another drop of the stuff.

Korben quickly straightens Leeloo up and puts her back in
the center of the beams.

KORBEN
Leeloo! If you don't get on with
the program we're all gonna die!
And that's not on my agenda for today.

Leeloo wraps her arms around Korben's neck.
117.

LEELOO
(weak)
What's the use of saving lives...
when you see what you do with them!

KORBEN
You're right but there are lots of
good things... beautiful things...

LEELOO
...Like love...

KORBEN
Exactly.

LEELOO
But I don't know love... I'm like a
machine programmed to save other
people's lives but never to have one
of my own.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The Scientist's stopwatch goes from 30 to 29 seconds.

INT. CHAPEL

LEELOO
I have thousands of memories but
none of them are mine... There is no
need for me other than this. I'm
immortal but I have no life.

KORBEN
Yes, you do! I need you. More than
you can imagine! Stand up straight!

LEELOO
Why?... Why would you need me?

KORBEN
Because...

CORNELIUS
(to himself)
Tell her, for God's sake!

A bit of the black acid falls on Loc Rhod's shirt setting it
on fire. He rips if off.

CUT TO:

INT. CHAPEL

KORBEN
Because...
118.

Leeloo has tears in her eyes. The heat is overpowering.
Black acid is everywhere.

LEELOO
Tell me...

KORBEN
I love you...

Despite her fatigue, Leeloo smiles broadly.

CUT TO:

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

The stopwatch goes from 3 to 2.

INT. CHAPEL

LEELOO
Now you're allowed to kiss me.

- Korben wraps his arms around her and kisses her like he's
never kissed anybody before. - The white beam, the Divine
Light, immediately forms around Leeloo and Korben. - The
stopwatch hits zero. - The Absolute Beam explodes from the
top of the pyramid and heads straight into the sky zapping
the fireball smack in the middle, slowing it down. Korben
and Leeloo kiss like there was no tomorrow.

- The beam hardens and slowly solidifies the Evil Planet.
Inaudible screeches escape from the dying planet. Screeches
of terrifying pain as if a million souls were dying.

- Streams of black acid spurt from the pyramid and solidify
like brilliant stalactites.

EXT. SPACE

The pure beam, the Light of Life, has finished its work.
The Dark Planet nothing more than a dead planet.

Strangely enough, it looks like the moon. Everything is
calm around it.

INT. PRESIDENT'S OFFICE

President Lindberg opens his eyes and realizes he's not dead-

SCIENTIST
The planet seems to have stopped
at... 62 miles from impact.

INT. CHAPEL

In the temple, the beam loses its intensity. But Leeloo and
Korben remain stuck together, lost in their kiss.
119.

Cornelius has dropped to his knees, clutching his hands.

Loc Rhod slips along the wall with a sigh. He gives Cornelius
a knowing smile.

LOC RHOD
This guy is a killer with the babes.
I knew it from the moment I laid
eyes on him.

Cornelius and Loc Rhod burst out laughing. Korben and Leeloo
keep on kissing.
Genres: ["Sci-Fi","Romance","Action"]

Summary Korben and Leeloo share a passionate kiss just as the white beam solidifies the Evil Planet, saving the world from destruction.
Strengths "The emotional exchange between Korben and Leeloo is powerful. The tension is kept high as the countdown to destruction continues in the background. The resolution of the conflict is satisfying."
Weaknesses "The black acid and stalactites do not seem to serve any real purpose in the plot and can be distracting."
Critique
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Scene 44 - The President's Visit to the Lab
INT. LABORATORY

We are in the Nucleological Laboratory that gave birth to
Leeloo in the beginning of our story. The President enters
the lab followed by a group of officials in ceremonial dress.

MUNRO
Mr. President, let me introduce you
to Professor Mactilburgh, who runs
the center.

MACTILBURGH
It's an honor to receive you. Mr.
President.

PRESIDENT
(beaming)
Yes.. Well? Where are our two heroes?

MACTILBURGH
They were so tired from their ordeal
that we put them in the reactor this
morning...

PRESIDENT
I have 19 more meetings after this
one Professor..

PROFESSOR
Of course.. Let me see if they're
revived.

AIDE
We go live in one minute, Mr.
President.

Mactilburgh goes to the reactor and opens a small slot which
allows him to see what is going on under the blue shield.

Leeloo and Korben are naked, arms wrapped around each other,
kissing and probably engaged in hoppi hoppa.

Mactilburgh looks troubled.
120.

MACTILBURGH
I... uh... they need five more
minutes, Mr. President.

The President, pressed for time, looks over to his aide who
is struggling with a phone call.

AIDE
No ma'am... I tried... No ma'am...

PRESIDENT
Who is it?

AIDE
Some woman... claims she's Korben's
mother...

PRESIDENT
Give it here...

The President takes the phone and goes to the window.

PRESIDENT
Mrs. Dallas, this in the President.
On behalf of the entire Federation,
I would like to thank...

MOTHER (V.O.)
Don't pull that crap with me,
Finger... I'd recognize that trash
can voice of yours in a dark alley
during a rain storm. You tell that
worthless no account son of mine he
should plotz for the way he's ignored
his mother... when I think of all I
sacrificed for him...

EXT. NEW YORK

Outside the lab we see the President through the window,
holding the phone away from his ear.

PAN slowly across Manhattan.

Credits Roll as TWO full rising silver moons ascend in the
dark blue sky.

THE END
Genres: ["Science Fiction","Comedy"]

Summary The President visits the laboratory where Leeloo was created and demands to see Korben and Leeloo, who are currently in the reactor together. He is interrupted by a phone call from Korben's mother, who is angry with him. The scene ends with the President holding the phone away from his ear as the credits roll and the camera pans across Manhattan to show two full moons in the sky.
Strengths "The scene is light-hearted and humorous, providing a nice break from the action. The dialogue between the President and Korben's mother is funny and adds to the comedy of the scene."
Weaknesses "The scene doesn't add much to the overall plot and doesn't have a significant emotional impact. The conflict is minimal and the theme is weak."
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