A Conclave Of Scoundrels
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USP: The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its historical setting and the intricate political and personal dynamics of the papal conclave. It offers a compelling look at a lesser-known historical event, enriched with well-developed characters and moral dilemmas, making it appealing to fans of historical dramas and political intrigue.
Overview
Genres: Drama, Historical, Historical Drama, Political, Comedy, Romance, Political Thriller, Political Intrigue, Religious Drama, Family, Historical Fiction, Action, Thriller
Setting: Medieval era, Viterbo, Italy
Overview: The screenplay has received an overall score of 7.8, indicating a generally well-executed and engaging story. Strengths include strong character development, sharp dialogue, and a compelling historical setting. Areas for improvement include enhancing emotional depth, raising the stakes, and deepening the thematic exploration.
Themes: Power and Politics, Family and Tradition, Religion and Faith, Community and Unity, Betrayal and Loyalty, Conflict and Resolution, Identity and Purpose, Justice and Order
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts revolve around the Papal election, the town's reputation, and personal struggles of the characters. The stakes include the future leadership of the Church, the well-being of the town, and the characters' relationships and beliefs.
Overall Mood: Tense, dramatic, and reflective
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 15: The scene captures the jubilant celebrations and emotional reunions after the Papal election.
Standout Features:
- Character-driven Narrative: The screenplay focuses on complex characters facing moral dilemmas and personal struggles.
- Political Intrigue : The intricate power dynamics and political maneuvering add depth and tension to the story.
- Historical Setting : The medieval era backdrop provides a rich and immersive environment for the narrative to unfold.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$30-40 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of historical dramas, political intrigue, and character-driven narratives.
Marketability: The screenplay offers a compelling mix of historical drama, political intrigue, and personal struggles that can attract a wide audience.
The unique blend of genres, strong character development, and engaging plot twists make it appealing to fans of historical dramas and political thrillers.
The screenplay's exploration of power dynamics, personal sacrifices, and moral dilemmas can resonate with audiences seeking thought-provoking narratives.
Profit Potential: High, due to the strong appeal to a wide adult audience, potential for critical acclaim, and international distribution.
Scene Level Percentiles
Screenplay Analysis
- The screenplay excels in internal goal score (81.51 percentile) and external goal score (69.75 percentile), indicating a strong focus on character motivations and clear objectives for the protagonist.
- The dialogue rating (64.64 percentile) and originality score (73.95 percentile) stand out as strengths, suggesting engaging and unique interactions between characters.
- Character changes (40.94 percentile) and story forward (39.86 percentile) could be improved to enhance character arcs and maintain a compelling narrative progression.
- Conflict level (35.36 percentile) and emotional impact (43.57 percentile) are areas that could benefit from more depth and intensity to heighten audience engagement.
The writer demonstrates a potential style focused on character-driven storytelling with a flair for engaging dialogue and original concepts.
Balancing Elements- To balance the screenplay, the writer should work on strengthening conflict levels while maintaining the strong dialogue and character development aspects.
- Enhancing emotional impact and character changes can further enrich the story without compromising the existing strengths in originality and goal-oriented storytelling.
The writer showcases an integrated approach, blending elements of intuition (dialogue, character) and concept (originality, structure) effectively.
Overall AssessmentWith refinement in character changes, conflict levels, and emotional impact, the screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and well-rounded narrative that engages audiences.
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Scene Dialogue | 7.9 | 64 | Memento: 7.8 | glass Onion Knives Out : 7.9 |
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Scene Emotional Impact | 7.6 | 42 | Fleabag: 7.5 | True Blood: 7.6 |
Scene Story Forward | 8.0 | 41 | Midsommar: 7.9 | severance (TV): 8.0 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.4 | 38 | Hot Fuzz: 7.3 | Vice: 7.4 |
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Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by rich descriptive language, historical authenticity, subtle humor, and a blend of warmth and authority in dialogue.
Best representation: Scene 13 - Tensions in the Town Square. This scene is the best representation because it effectively conveys the historical setting, the characters' motivations, and the political tensions through eloquent dialogue and descriptive language.
Memorable Lines:
- MAYOR MONTEBUONO: Recognition is the ultimate honor to which a man can aspire, and I am prepared to soar into its embrace... is there any reason for concern? I want to ensure everything proceeds as planned. (Scene 4)
- Raniero: I am Raniero Gatti, Captain of the people. (Scene 18)
- King Charles: Ah, the sweet melody of justice, played on the strings of pain. (Scene 12)
- Mayor Montebuono: A small sacrifice on our part, and we gain abundantly. You wouldn’t want to disrupt that, would you? (Scene 14)
- Father Luzio: Today, we gather to welcome this child into the embrace of our faith. May his journey be guided by the light of God's love... (Scene 41)
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a writing style characterized by sharp dialogue, complex character interactions, exploration of power dynamics, and thematic depth.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- David Mamet
Story Shape
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
The feature screenplay 'A Conclave of Scoundrels' is a historical drama that skillfully blends high-stakes political intrigue, complex character arcs, and a richly detailed depiction of the town of Viterbo during a prolonged Papal election. The script offers a compelling narrative that explores the consequences of ambition, the dynamics of power, and the resilience of a community facing adversity. With its strong thematic underpinnings, well-developed characters, and impressive attention to historical accuracy, the screenplay presents a unique and compelling story that would appeal to audiences interested in period dramas, political sagas, and character-driven narratives.
- The opening sequences effectively establish the historical context, setting, and key characters, drawing the audience into the world of 13th-century Italy and the impending Papal election. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 )
- The screenplay demonstrates a strong grasp of political intrigue and the dynamics of power, as evidenced by the well-crafted scenes exploring the town's efforts to influence the Papal election. high ( Scene 26 Scene 27 )
- The climactic resolution of the Papal election is a well-executed narrative arc that ties together the various storylines and character arcs in a satisfying and thematically resonant manner. high ( Scene 38 Scene 39 )
- The screenplay showcases a strong sense of historical accuracy and attention to detail, seamlessly integrating the political and social dynamics of the era into the narrative. medium ( Scene 16 Scene 24 )
- The character arcs, particularly those of Raniero and his family, are well-developed and emotionally resonant, adding depth and relatability to the story. high ( Scene 35 Scene 41 )
- While the pacing is generally strong, there are a few instances where the narrative slows down, particularly in the middle sections of the screenplay, which could benefit from tighter editing and a more streamlined approach. medium ( Scene 9 Scene 14 )
- The subplot involving King Charles of Anjou's interference in the Papal election, while intriguing, could be further developed and integrated more seamlessly into the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 12 Scene 13 )
- While the screenplay excels in its historical accuracy, there are opportunities to further explore the sociopolitical context of the era, particularly the tensions between the various factions and their motivations, to provide a more nuanced understanding of the underlying conflicts. medium
- The screenplay could benefit from a more in-depth exploration of the dynamics within the College of Cardinals, providing deeper insights into the political machinations and personal motivations of the individual Cardinals. medium ( Scene 19 Scene 20 )
- While the screenplay effectively captures the struggles of the Viterbo citizens, there are opportunities to further develop the perspectives and experiences of a broader range of supporting characters, adding additional layers of complexity and empathy to the narrative. medium
- The screenplay's portrayal of the town's creative and resourceful response to the Cardinals' confinement is a standout, showcasing the resilience and ingenuity of the community in the face of adversity. high ( Scene 23 Scene 24 )
- The emotional arcs and relationships between Raniero, Madolina, and Don Ofredo are compelling and well-executed, providing a human dimension to the historical events. high ( Scene 35 Scene 36 )
- The resolution of Raniero's excommunication and the lifting of the interdict on Viterbo is a powerful and thematically resonant climax that reinforces the screenplay's central themes of justice, sacrifice, and the triumph of the human spirit. high ( Scene 37 Scene 38 )
- Character Development While the screenplay excels in the development of the central characters, such as Raniero, Madolina, and Don Ofredo, there are opportunities to further explore the perspectives and arcs of the supporting characters, particularly the individual Cardinals and members of the Viterbo community. Additional character-driven scenes and dialogue could help to create a more rounded and nuanced understanding of the various factions and their motivations. medium
- Dialogue There are a few instances where the dialogue feels slightly on-the-nose or expositional, particularly in scenes where characters are explaining political or historical context. While these moments are not frequent, they could be further polished to ensure a more natural and organic flow of conversation. low
Engine: GPT4
Consider
Executive Summary
A Conclave Of Scoundrels is a historical drama set in 1268, revolving around the longest papal conclave in history. The screenplay excels in character development, historical accuracy, and thematic depth. However, it suffers from pacing issues and occasional inconsistencies in tone. The narrative is compelling, but it could benefit from tighter editing and more focused storytelling.
- The screenplay excels in setting up a rich historical context and atmosphere, immersing the audience in the 13th century. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 )
- Strong character development, particularly of Raniero and Cardinal Orsini, adds depth and emotional resonance to the story. high ( Scene 3 Scene 4 )
- The screenplay effectively portrays the political intrigue and power struggles within the Church, keeping the audience engaged. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 6 )
- The dialogue is well-crafted, capturing the formal tone of the period while revealing character motivations and conflicts. medium ( Scene 7 Scene 8 )
- The screenplay's thematic exploration of faith, duty, and sacrifice adds layers of meaning to the narrative. high ( Scene 9 Scene 10 )
- The pacing is uneven, with some scenes dragging while others feel rushed. Tighter editing could improve the flow. high ( Scene 11 Scene 12 )
- Occasional inconsistencies in tone, shifting abruptly between serious drama and lighter moments, can be jarring. medium ( Scene 13 Scene 14 )
- Some secondary characters lack depth and could be further developed to enhance the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 15 Scene 16 )
- The screenplay could benefit from more visual storytelling, relying less on dialogue to convey key plot points. medium ( Scene 17 Scene 18 )
- The climax feels somewhat anticlimactic. Building more tension leading up to the resolution could make it more impactful. high ( Scene 19 Scene 20 )
- The screenplay lacks a strong female presence. Introducing more significant female characters could add diversity and depth. medium ( Scene 21 Scene 22 )
- More backstory for key characters like Raniero and Cardinal Orsini would help the audience understand their motivations better. medium ( Scene 23 Scene 24 )
- The screenplay could benefit from more moments of levity to balance the heavy political and religious themes. low ( Scene 25 Scene 26 )
- The historical accuracy and attention to detail are commendable, adding authenticity to the narrative. high ( Scene 27 Scene 28 )
- The moral and ethical dilemmas faced by the characters are well-explored, adding depth to the story. high ( Scene 29 Scene 30 )
- The screenplay's exploration of faith and duty resonates strongly, making it thought-provoking and engaging. high ( Scene 31 Scene 32 )
- Pacing The screenplay suffers from uneven pacing, with some scenes dragging while others feel rushed. This affects the overall flow and engagement of the narrative. high
- Tone There are occasional inconsistencies in tone, shifting abruptly between serious drama and lighter moments. This can be jarring for the audience. medium
- Excessive Dialogue The screenplay relies heavily on dialogue to convey key plot points, which can make it feel less dynamic and more static. medium
- Underdeveloped Secondary Characters Some secondary characters lack depth and could be further developed to enhance the overall narrative. medium
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.5/10, The screenplay establishes a compelling and clear premise with a unique historical setting and intriguing characters. However, there is room for improvement in the clarity of the political landscape and the stakes for the main character. See More
Structure: 7.0, The screenplay's structure and plot demonstrate a strong foundation with well-defined characters and a clear sense of progression. However, there are areas for improvement in pacing and conflict escalation to maintain audience engagement and heighten dramatic tension. See More
Theme: 8.5, The screenplay effectively explores a range of compelling themes, including duty, family, faith, and the challenges of leadership during a period of political turmoil. The themes are well-integrated into the narrative, creating a rich and layered story that resonates on emotional and intellectual levels. While the clarity and impact of the themes are generally strong, there are opportunities to further enhance their universality and cohesion across the various character arcs. See More
Visual Impact: 8.25, The screenplay's visual imagery is generally strong, with vivid descriptions that effectively set the tone and establish the historical setting. The various scenes offer a good balance of intimate character interactions and grand visual setpieces, allowing the reader to immerse themselves in the world of the story. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the visual creativity and consistency throughout the screenplay, as well as integrate the visuals more seamlessly with the narrative. With some targeted revisions, the screenplay's visual storytelling could become a true strength that elevates the overall experience. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.5, The screenplay effectively elicits a range of emotional responses, particularly through its well-developed characters and nuanced relationships. However, there is room for further exploration of emotional depth and complexity, particularly in the resolution of emotional arcs and themes. See More
Conflict: 7.5, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes, particularly in the political maneuvering surrounding the papal election and the personal struggles of the main characters. However, there is room for improvement in deepening the emotional connections between the audience and the characters, and in raising the stakes to create a greater sense of urgency and investment. See More
Originality: 7.5, The screenplay demonstrates solid originality and creativity in its storytelling, with a unique blend of historical and personal narratives. The characters are well-developed, and the dialogue is engaging, providing a rich backdrop for the political intrigue and interpersonal relationships. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Cardinal Orsini rushes to the Palace to meet with Pope Clement IV, who is on his deathbed. They discuss the upcoming election of a new Pope. The scene is somber and reflective, with Pope Clement IV expressing skepticism and humor about the situation. The conflict arises from the uncertainty of who will succeed Pope Clement IV as the new Pope, which is not resolved in this scene. The visual elements include the opulent room where Pope Clement IV lies on his deathbed, surrounded by bishops and saints painted on the walls. The scene ends with Pope Clement IV passing away with a wry grin on his face, leaving Cardinal Orsini and the bishops puzzled.
- Captain Raniero Gatti interacts with his daughters Bellina and Lucida, as well as his wife Madolina, in their quaint cottage bedroom in the countryside. Playful banter and negotiations ensue over who gets to accompany Raniero to the village. The conflict is resolved when Raniero decides the girls will stay and help their mother instead. The emotional tone is warm, playful, and loving, with key dialogue highlighting the family dynamics. The scene ends with Raniero sharing a tender moment with Madolina before hurrying out the door.
- Raniero walks through the bustling town of Viterbo during a festival, interacting with villagers and visiting a flower stand. He enters a tavern where he jokes with the head cook, Francesca, and shares banter with her. The scene is light-hearted and jovial, with no major conflicts, and ends with Raniero planting a kiss on Francesca's cheek before dashing out of the tavern, leaving her smiling and the staff thunderstruck.
- Raniero meets his father-in-law, Don Ofredo, in the street to discuss the upcoming visit of important guests. He then meets with Father Luzio at the cathedral and Mayor Montebuono at his residence to discuss preparations for the event. There is a conflict between Raniero and Mayor Montebuono regarding accommodations for the guests, which is resolved when Mayor Montebuono suggests using Moretti's estate. The scene ends with the resolution of the conflict.
- Raniero addresses the townsfolk and city officials in Viterbo Cathedral, expressing gratitude. Signor Moretti shows resentment towards the hospitality extended to the cardinals, while Father Luzio is teased by the crowd. Light-hearted comments from the Thin Villager and Pudgy Lady provide humor, but tension arises when an Older Villager questions the feasting of the cardinals. The scene ends with the arrival of the Cardinals, greeted by cheering citizens.
- The Cardinals dine at a lavish table, exchanging insults and banter while discussing important matters. Francesca eavesdrops on their conversation and later confesses to Father Luzio. Father Luzio sends a secret note through messengers to gather information about the Cardinals' interactions. The scene is filled with tension, power dynamics, and underlying conflicts, with hints of potential future revelations.
- In this scene, Federico rings the bell in the bell chamber, Orsini prays in his private chamber, Pantaleone is escorted by Papal Guards through the town, the Cardinals gather in the Papal Palace for the election of the next pontiff, Raniero and Father Luzio discuss the ongoing events in the main square, and the Cardinals vote for the next Pope but fail to reach a decision. The conflict arises when the Cardinals cannot come to a consensus, leading to accusations and disagreements among them. The emotional tone is tense and suspenseful as the Cardinals struggle to make a decision, with key dialogue including Cardinal Odo leading the Cardinals in prayer and arguments over the voting results. The scene ends with the Cardinals still unable to reach a decision, causing further tension and disagreements.
- The scene begins with the Cardinals leaving the Papal Palace after an unsuccessful election. Raniero saves a young boy from a near tragedy, showcasing his leadership. The tension rises as Don Ofredo expresses his desire for an Italian pope, causing Madolina to become upset. The scene ends with Raniero and Don Ofredo drinking wine in silence, leaving the unresolved tension hanging in the air.
- In this scene, the protagonist successfully escapes from the clutches of the villain after a daring chase through the city streets. With quick thinking and resourcefulness, they outsmart their pursuers and make a narrow getaway. The tension and excitement build as the protagonist narrowly avoids capture multiple times, finally managing to slip away to safety.
- Francesca encounters Father Luzio and bruised Cardinals in the cathedral, where tensions rise over alliances and divisions in the Papal election. A bundle of notes passes through various hands, including the Messenger, Tailor, Captain General, and Hooded Man. Orsini and Pantaleone have a tense conversation in the Sacristy Chamber, highlighting the secretive and tense atmosphere of the scene.
- Raniero is interrupted by a guard about a bunk dispute in the barracks. His daughters and wife bring him fruit and discuss family matters. Raniero receives notes from Father Luzio and hides them. They all watch the Cardinals being escorted through the streets by Papal Guards.
- Raniero and his family watch as the Papal Guards escort the Cardinals back to their residence, with Orsini shaking his head in dread. The scene then transitions to Castel Nuovo three months later, where King Charles interrogates a prisoner in a dungeon with the threat of torture to extract information about Conradin's supporters. The prisoner pleads for mercy as King Charles looms ominously, casting a tense and foreboding atmosphere. The scene ends with King Charles leaving the dungeon, leaving the prisoner's cries echoing behind.
- King Charles receives a note from a courier informing him of the indecision among the Cardinals in Sicily. Frustrated by the lack of a Pope sensitive to his cause, he discusses potential strategies with Alard in the Great Hall of Castel Nuovo. The conflict arises from the indecision of the Cardinals and is resolved through the decision to make a royal visit to enhance influence over Italy. The scene ends with King Charles deciding to leave at dawn for the visit, leaving Pierre in charge in his absence.
- Raniero observes a growing unrest in the town square and later deals with a dispute between a merchant and a farmer. He shows leadership by stepping in to resolve the conflict and tries to maintain peace amidst the rising tensions. The scene ends with Raniero reluctantly agreeing to Mayor Montebuono's decision to maintain the status quo for the sake of the town's reputation.
- In this scene, Raniero searches for his missing family in their cottage, only to find them gone. He then meets Madolina in the shed, where they discuss the tension in the household and the pressure they are under due to the ongoing election crisis. The dialogue reveals their frustrations and the lack of control they have over the situation, ending with a sense of uncertainty and struggle.
- Raniero and Madolina are interrupted during a passionate moment by a loud thud against the wall. Raniero then visits Francesca in the tavern where they discuss the pressure of preparing feasts for influential men and Raniero offers to name his next daughter after Francesca.
- The scene depicts the changing seasons in Viterbo Town Square where townsfolk go about their daily routines. It transitions to a tense confrontation in a Guild Hall at night, where Raniero and Montebuono face an angry mob of townsfolk demanding action and a new Pope. The conflict arises from frustrations over the delay in electing a new Pope and lack of resources, leading to a confrontational and agitated tone as tensions escalate between the townsfolk and their leaders.
- Raniero seeks guidance from God in the cathedral and is joined by Father Luzio who offers wisdom. They rush to the Porta Romana Gates where they encounter a delegation from King Charles of Anjou demanding an audience with the College of Cardinals. The scene is tense and uncertain as the conflict arises, leaving Raniero and the town facing more problems and uncertainty.
- The Captain General and two Papal Guards escort Cardinal Pantaleone to King Charles's tent where the King expresses his frustration with the Cardinal's lack of progress in swaying the other Cardinals. King Charles threatens to execute the Cardinal if he fails to deliver results, leaving the scene tense and threatening.
- In an abandoned storeroom at night, Raniero and city officials discuss the recent papal election results and the potential implications for their city. Raniero is hopeful, Mayor Montebuono is concerned about maintaining peace, and the officials agree to maintain secrecy and vigilance to prevent unrest. The scene ends with a sense of cautious optimism for the future.
- In this scene, the Cardinals are attacked by villagers with rotten vegetables and fruits as they make their way to the Papal Palace. Inside the palace, the Cardinals discuss the attack and Cardinal Odo decides to withdraw his name from the candidacy for Pope. Father Luzio disapproves of the villagers' actions, while the Bookmaker takes bets on the Cardinals. The conflict is resolved when Cardinal Odo announces his withdrawal, ending the tense and dramatic scene.
- In the abandoned storeroom at night, Mayor Montebuono confesses to breaking the oath of secrecy to his wife, causing a breach in their plans. Raniero confronts him and decides to exclude him from future meetings, leading to tension among the city officials. The scene ends with Mayor Montebuono leaving the room after being excluded by Raniero.
- The Tailor is accused of being a spy by the Captain General, leading to a confrontation between Raniero and the Captain General's men in the market square. Raniero insists on questioning the Tailor according to city laws, ultimately leading to a tense standoff that is temporarily resolved when the Captain General agrees to let Raniero proceed with the interrogation.
- In the town hall jail at dusk, the Tailor is being whipped by Raniero. Despite the physical pain, they share a drink and discuss their personal troubles. Together, they plan to concoct a believable confession to protect themselves, resolving the conflict temporarily. The scene ends with Raniero and the Tailor in agreement on their plan.
- Cardinals gather in the main chamber of the Papal Palace for negotiations, with Cardinal Pantaleone trying to convince Cardinal Pironti and Cardinal Ubaldini to consider compromise. However, the tension escalates when Cardinal Pironti suddenly collapses and dies, leading to despair in the room. The scene transitions to a somber funeral procession and the town showing signs of fatigue and tension as autumn sets in.
- Cardinal Orsini interrupts Cardinal Pantaleone and the French faction's relaxation at the thermal baths to express frustration over the Church's turmoil. Pantaleone defends their need for solace amidst the deadlock in choosing a new Pope. Meanwhile, Raniero discovers Madolina's pregnancy, leading to a joyful moment between the couple. The scene is filled with tension, frustration, and joy as characters navigate their concerns and moments of happiness.
- Raniero confronts Mayor Montebuono about the city's reputation and convinces him to sequester the Cardinals. He then recruits Sir Guillaume to meet with King Charles, who did not actually summon him. The scene ends with the Knights being barred from the city by closing gates, setting up a new obstacle for them to overcome.
- The Knights scale the city walls, open the gates, and charge into the city. King Charles confronts defiant villagers and soldiers in the main square, with tensions running high. Alard advises against violence, while Pierre offers an alternative solution. The conflict is resolved when King Charles decides to avoid violence and find another way to achieve their goals, as his forces gallop away.
- The Cardinals struggle to sleep on the cold stone floors of the Papal Palace, with Cardinal Bancsa's loud snoring causing disruption. Meanwhile, Francesca serves a lavish banquet at the tavern where Raniero discusses the Cardinals with her. Raniero then instructs the Burly Guard on security measures at the Papal Palace. The scene ends with Raniero finding his quarters' door ajar, hinting at a potential intrusion or unexpected event.
- Pierre interrogates Raniero in his quarters at Podesta Palace, revealing his authority as Chief Interrogator and threatening Raniero's position as Captain General. The Tailor is released after serving his purpose, and the scene ends with Pierre ordering the Captain General to keep the incriminating messages a secret as they burn in the fireplace.
- Pierre and Sir Guillaume confront Mayor Montebuono and the citizens of Viterbo at the gates. Montebuono and the citizens confess to being part of the conspiracy. Evidence is presented against the Captain General, leading to his release. The scene ends with Mayor Montebuono releasing the Captain General and declaring that the conspiracy turmoil is behind them.
- In this scene, King Charles confronts Pierre about their covert dealings with Cardinal Pantaleone and tasks him with delivering a note. Meanwhile, tension rises among the Cardinals at the Papal Palace as they struggle to choose a successor. Raniero challenges the Cardinals with meager provisions and locks them in the chamber, adding to the suspense and power dynamics in the scene.
- The scene takes place at the Papal Palace during a funeral procession before transitioning to Raniero's cottage. Raniero and Madolina express concern for Don Ofredo's health and discuss the lack of resolution in the election. Raniero comes up with a drastic solution to address the family's concerns and the unresolved election.
- In this scene, the villagers work together to repair the roof of the Papal Palace while the Cardinals continue their deliberations. King Charles and King Philip III discuss the villagers' efforts to sway the cardinals, and King Philip plans to visit the cardinals in the morning. The conflict revolves around the Cardinals' deadlock and the villagers' attempts to influence them, with a mix of determination, camaraderie, and political intrigue present throughout the scene.
- A delegate from King Philip declares the town of Viterbo under interdict, causing unrest among the townspeople. The Cardinals debate the decision in the Papal Palace, while the townspeople at the guild hall decide to stand against the interdict. The scene ends with the discovery of a murdered English nobleman outside the Church of San Silvestro.
- Don Ofredo leaves Raniero's cottage on a horse-drawn carriage, while Raniero and Madolina watch him go. Madolina reassures Raniero that the town's situation is not his fault but his responsibility. Raniero then goes to the main square and comforts Federico, the young bell ringer, who is struggling with being forbidden to ring the church bell. The scene ends with Raniero offering words of encouragement to Federico and walking away, leaving Federico contemplating his words.
- Raniero confronts the Cardinals in the Papal Palace main chamber, demanding the end of the interdict on Viterbo. The Cardinals discuss the consequences of lifting the interdict and ultimately decide to excommunicate Raniero. Cardinal Odo pronounces the sentence of excommunication on Raniero, leading to a tense and dramatic confrontation. The scene ends with Cardinal Odo lifting the interdict on Viterbo and Raniero exiting the room.
- Federico rings the church bells, bringing relief and joy to the villagers. Madolina pleads with Raniero to confess and lift the curse from his name. Raniero explains his actions and seeks Madolina's support. A downpour hits the town, causing chaos and discomfort. The Cardinals discuss appointing a committee of six to make decisions.
- After a storm passes, the townsfolk and soldiers emerge from their shelters. The Cardinals engage in a discussion to choose the new Holy Father, ultimately selecting Teobaldo Visconti. Raniero, carrying bread and water, reacts with disbelief to the news. The scene takes place in the main chamber of the Papal Palace, with a tone of relief, determination, and disbelief. The conflict of choosing a new Holy Father is resolved with Teobaldo Visconti's unanimous selection, while Raniero's disbelief creates a minor conflict left unresolved. The scene ends with Raniero rushing out in disbelief, leaving the Cardinals perplexed.
- Raniero spreads the news of Teobaldo Visconti being chosen as Pope throughout the town, leading to joyous celebrations. The Cardinals observe the festivities from the Papal Palace. Meanwhile, in the Holy Land, Christian knights battle Muslim warriors. Teobaldo Visconti receives a surprising message in the Holy Land, causing him to grapple with the decision to become Pope, ultimately guided by his aide, Brother Matteo.
- Brother Matteo announces Teobaldo Visconti as the new Pope to the assembled knights, leading to jubilant cheers. Various characters celebrate the news, including Teobaldo on his pilgrimage, King Charles and King Philip raising goblets, Madelina and Raniero embracing their newborn son, and Don Ofredo quietly leaving the ceremony, causing concern among others.
- Don Ofredo reconciles with Raniero and his family, defying Cardinal Pantaleone. Teobaldo arrives and releases Raniero from excommunication, baptizing his child. The scene ends with a tranquil baptism ceremony.
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Character Cardinal Pantaleone
Description Cardinal Pantaleone's behavior shifts from a calculating, power-hungry individual in the earlier scene to a more reactionary and emotional character in the later scene. This inconsistency in his motivations and decision-making process is not fully explained.
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Character Mayor Montebuono
Description Montebuono's attitude towards Raniero's plan shifts from initial reluctance to eventually giving his full support. The motivation behind this change is not clearly established, making his character's actions seem more driven by the needs of the plot rather than his own consistent beliefs and motivations.
( Scene 14 (INTERIOR MONTEBUONO'S QUARTERS - PODESTA PALACE) Scene 22 (INTERIOR ABANDONED STOREROOM) )
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Description The sequence of events around King Charles's reaction to the gates being closed is unclear. It's not fully explained how the Knights were able to enter the city after the gates were locked, nor how King Charles and his forces were barred from entering the city. This creates a gap in the narrative's logical flow.
( Scene 18 (EXTERIOR PORTA ROMANA GATES - DAY) Scene 19 (INTERIOR KING CHARLES'S TENT - NIGHT) ) -
Description The story does not clearly explain how Raniero was able to secure Montebuono's support for sequestering the Cardinals, and then later how Raniero was able to avoid being taken into custody by the Captain General and King Charles's forces. The transition between these two events feels abrupt and lacks a clear narrative connection.
( Scene 27 (INTERIOR MONTEBUONO'S QUARTERS - PODESTA PALACE - DUSK) Scene 31 (EXTERIOR VITERBO STREET - DAY) )
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Description It's not entirely clear what King Charles's specific plans and motivations are in relation to the papal election. While his desire to influence the outcome is established, the script does not provide a clear explanation of how he intends to achieve this or the specific consequences he fears if the election does not go his way. This leaves some of the narrative's central conflict points feeling underdeveloped.
( Scene 19 (INTERIOR KING CHARLES'S TENT - NIGHT) Scene 32 (INTERIOR KING CHARLES'S TENT - NIGHT) )
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Description The dialogue between the city officials in this scene, particularly their use of formal and somewhat stilted language, does not always feel fully authentic to the characters or the situation. It occasionally comes across as more expository than a natural back-and-forth conversation.
( Scene 28 (INTERIOR ABANDONED STOREROOM - NIGHT) )
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Element Dialogue
( Scene 2 (INTERIOR COTTAGE BEDROOM - MORNING) Scene 3 (EXTERIOR COTTAGE - SOON AFTER) )
Suggestion The exchange between Raniero and his daughters about who gets to go to the village could be condensed or streamlined, as it covers similar ground in two consecutive scenes. -
Element Action
( Scene 21 (EXTERIOR MAIN SQUARE - MORNING) Scene 31 (EXTERIOR VITERBO STREET - DAY) )
Suggestion The scenes depicting the Cardinals being escorted through the town could be consolidated, as they cover similar events in different locations.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Cardinal Orsini | Cardinal Orsini starts off as a cautious and diplomatic Cardinal, carefully navigating the political landscape. As the story progresses, he begins to question his alliances and beliefs, delving deeper into his spirituality and seeking a deeper connection with his faith. This inner journey leads him to make a bold decision that ultimately changes the course of the story. | The character arc for Cardinal Orsini is well-developed and engaging, but it could benefit from more external conflict to further challenge his beliefs and decisions. Additionally, more interactions with other characters could help to showcase different facets of his personality and deepen his relationships. | To improve the character arc for Cardinal Orsini, consider introducing a rival Cardinal who challenges his beliefs and forces him to confront his own values. This conflict could add depth to his character development and create more tension in the story. Additionally, explore more opportunities for Orsini to interact with other characters, allowing for more dynamic relationships and showcasing different aspects of his personality. |
Raniero | Raniero starts as a loving father and captain, balancing his family life with his responsibilities. As the political turmoil in Viterbo escalates, he becomes a dedicated and capable leader, torn between his family responsibilities and political duties. Throughout the feature, Raniero grapples with guilt, redemption, and the weight of his past actions, ultimately undergoing significant growth and finding closure through his commitment to justice and sacrifice for the greater good. | The character arc for Raniero is well-developed, showcasing his evolution from a loving father to a conflicted leader grappling with personal and political challenges. However, there could be more clarity in depicting the specific events or decisions that lead to his growth and redemption. Additionally, the emotional journey of Raniero could be further explored to deepen the audience's connection with his internal struggles and motivations. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating pivotal moments or decisions that highlight Raniero's internal conflicts and growth more explicitly. Showcasing his emotional journey through impactful scenes and dialogue can enhance the audience's understanding of his character development. Additionally, exploring Raniero's relationships with other characters and how they influence his decisions could add depth to his arc and create more engaging dynamics within the screenplay. |
Madolina | Madolina starts as a caring and patient mother, navigating family dynamics with diplomacy and negotiation tactics. As the political unrest impacts her family, she becomes more vocal about her frustrations and seeks comfort in moments of vulnerability. Throughout the screenplay, Madolina's resilience and unwavering support for her family are tested, leading to a deeper exploration of her strength and protective nature. | The character arc for Madolina is well-developed, showcasing her evolution from a diplomatic mother to a vocal and resilient figure in the face of adversity. However, there could be more exploration of her internal conflicts and desires, adding depth to her character development. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating scenes that delve into Madolina's internal struggles and desires, showcasing her complexity beyond her role as a caregiver. This could add layers to her character and provide a more nuanced portrayal of her journey throughout the screenplay. |
Mayor Montebuono | Mayor Montebuono starts as a proud and ambitious leader focused on reputation and status. As the story progresses, he is faced with difficult decisions and betrayals that lead to internal conflict and regret. However, he ultimately shows resilience and determination in protecting the city's interests, leading to redemption and a deeper loyalty to the townspeople. | The character arc for Mayor Montebuono is well-developed, showcasing his internal struggles and growth throughout the story. However, there could be more clarity in his motivations and the consequences of his actions. Additionally, more emphasis on his relationships with other characters could add depth to his arc. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Mayor Montebuono's relationships with other characters, particularly those who challenge his beliefs and decisions. This could provide more opportunities for conflict and growth. Additionally, adding more moments of vulnerability and introspection could further highlight his internal struggles and redemption. |
Cardinal Odo | Cardinal Odo starts off as a powerful and authoritative figure, firmly rooted in his beliefs and duties to the Church. However, as the story progresses, he begins to question his own motivations and the true meaning of power. Through a series of events and interactions with other characters, he starts to realize that true strength lies in humility and selflessness. By the end of the screenplay, Cardinal Odo undergoes a transformation, choosing to step down from his position of power in order to serve a greater purpose. | The character arc for Cardinal Odo is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for the audience to follow. However, there could be more emphasis on the internal struggles and conflicts that lead to his eventual transformation. This would add depth to his character and make his decision to step down more impactful. | To improve the character arc for Cardinal Odo, consider adding more scenes that delve into his internal struggles and conflicting emotions. Show moments of vulnerability and doubt that challenge his beliefs and convictions. This will make his transformation more believable and resonate with the audience on a deeper level. |
Cardinal Ubaldini | Cardinal Ubaldini starts off as a confident and witty Cardinal who is suspicious of the French cardinals. As the story progresses, he is forced to confront his own beliefs and values, leading to a transformation in which he learns to trust others and embrace change. He ultimately becomes a more open-minded and compassionate leader, willing to challenge his own assumptions for the greater good. | The character arc for Cardinal Ubaldini is well-developed and provides a satisfying journey for the audience. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and conflicts to make his transformation more impactful. Additionally, his interactions with other characters could be further explored to enhance his growth and development. | To improve the character arc for Cardinal Ubaldini, consider delving deeper into his personal history and motivations to provide a more nuanced understanding of his beliefs and values. Explore his relationships with other characters in more detail to showcase his growth and transformation through meaningful interactions. Additionally, consider adding more obstacles and challenges for him to overcome, which will make his journey more compelling and engaging for the audience. |
Cardinal Pantaleone | Cardinal Pantaleone starts off as a cunning and manipulative figure, using deception to achieve his goals. However, as the story progresses, he becomes more conflicted and introspective, grappling with moral dilemmas and the consequences of his actions. Through the challenges he faces, he learns the value of compromise and pragmatism, ultimately leading to a transformation where he becomes a wiser and more diplomatic Cardinal. | The character arc for Cardinal Pantaleone is well-developed, showcasing a transformation from a manipulative figure to a more introspective and diplomatic one. However, the arc could be further enhanced by providing more specific moments or events that trigger his change in perspective. This would help to make his character development more impactful and believable. | To improve the character arc for Cardinal Pantaleone, consider adding key scenes or interactions that challenge his beliefs and force him to reevaluate his actions. This could include moments of moral dilemma, personal loss, or unexpected alliances that push him out of his comfort zone. By showing a more gradual and nuanced transformation, the audience will be more invested in his journey and growth as a character. |
Don Ofredo | Don Ofredo starts as a strict and traditional figure, focused on upholding family values and traditions. However, as the story progresses, he learns to adapt and embrace change, realizing the importance of love and forgiveness over rigid beliefs. Through various challenges and conflicts, Don Ofredo's character evolves into a more compassionate and understanding individual, ultimately finding redemption and a deeper connection with his family. | The character arc for Don Ofredo is well-developed and provides a satisfying journey for the audience. However, there could be more emphasis on the internal struggles and conflicts that lead to his transformation. Additionally, exploring his relationships with other characters in more depth could add complexity and depth to his arc. | To improve the character arc, consider adding more scenes that delve into Don Ofredo's internal conflicts and the reasons behind his strict beliefs. Show moments of vulnerability and doubt that challenge his worldview and lead to personal growth. Additionally, explore his relationships with other characters, such as his daughter and grandchildren, to showcase different facets of his personality and provide opportunities for emotional development. |
Cardinal De Bray | Throughout the screenplay, Cardinal De Bray starts off as a polarizing and confident figure, using humor as a weapon in his interactions. However, as the story progresses, his frustrations and impatience begin to surface, revealing a more vulnerable and complex side to his character. Through a series of events and interactions with other characters, he learns to let go of his defenses and confront his inner struggles, ultimately finding a sense of peace and acceptance. | The character arc for Cardinal De Bray is well-developed and allows for growth and depth. However, there could be more clarity in the catalysts that lead to his transformation. Additionally, his interactions with other characters could be further explored to provide a deeper understanding of his internal conflicts. | To improve the character arc, consider adding specific events or revelations that trigger Cardinal De Bray's frustrations and impatience. This will help to create a more compelling and believable transformation for the character. Additionally, delve deeper into his relationships with other characters to showcase the complexity of his emotions and motivations. |
King Charles | King Charles starts as a ruthless and ambitious ruler, focused on expanding his territories. As the story progresses, he faces challenges that force him to reconsider his tactics and alliances. He begins to question the cost of his actions and the impact they have on those around him. Ultimately, he undergoes a transformation, realizing the importance of empathy and collaboration in maintaining his power and securing his legacy. | The character arc for King Charles is well-developed, showing a clear progression from ruthless ambition to a more nuanced understanding of power dynamics. However, the transition could be more effectively portrayed through specific events or interactions that highlight his internal conflict and growth. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating key moments where King Charles is forced to confront the consequences of his actions and make difficult decisions that challenge his beliefs. Show his internal struggle more explicitly through his interactions with other characters, allowing the audience to see his transformation unfold in a more impactful way. |
Theme | Theme Details | Theme Explanation | ||
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Power and Politics (25%) | The screenplay revolves around the power struggles and political maneuvering involved in the election of a new Pope, as well as the interactions between the Cardinals, King Charles, and the city officials. | This theme is central to the plot as it drives the actions of the characters and creates tension and conflict throughout the screenplay. | ||
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Family and Tradition (20%) | The importance of family and tradition is highlighted through Raniero's interactions with his family, especially his wife Madolina and father-in-law Don Ofredo. | This theme adds depth to the characters and provides a contrast to the political intrigue unfolding in the story. | ||
Religion and Faith (15%) | The role of religion and faith is prominent in the screenplay, with scenes set in the cathedral, discussions about the papal election, and conflicts over the interdict on Viterbo. | This theme explores the spiritual beliefs and moral dilemmas faced by the characters in the midst of political turmoil. | ||
Community and Unity (10%) | The townspeople of Viterbo come together to support each other, repair the Papal Palace, and stand against the interdict imposed on their town. | This theme emphasizes the importance of community solidarity and unity in times of crisis. | ||
Betrayal and Loyalty (10%) | Characters like Mayor Montebuono and the Tailor are involved in betrayals and confessions, while Raniero remains loyal to his family and town despite challenges. | This theme explores the complex dynamics of trust, loyalty, and betrayal among the characters in the screenplay. | ||
Conflict and Resolution (10%) | The screenplay is driven by conflicts such as the papal election deadlock, the interdict on Viterbo, and the tensions between the Cardinals and the townspeople. | This theme highlights the struggles and resolutions faced by the characters as they navigate through political, personal, and moral conflicts. | ||
Identity and Purpose (5%) | Characters like Raniero and the Cardinals grapple with questions of identity, purpose, and responsibility in the midst of the election crisis and power struggles. | This theme delves into the characters' search for meaning, self-discovery, and fulfillment in the face of challenging circumstances. | ||
Justice and Order (5%) | Themes of justice and order are explored through Raniero's efforts to maintain peace in the town, confront betrayals, and uphold the city laws. | This theme examines the concepts of justice, fairness, and maintaining order in a society plagued by political intrigue and unrest. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal is to navigate the delicate political landscape of the Church and ensure a smooth transition of power after Pope Clement IV's death. Raniero's internal goal is to balance his responsibilities as a father and husband with his duties outside the home. |
External Goals | Cardinal Orsini's external goal is to inform Pope Clement IV about the upcoming election and the completion of the Papal palace in Viterbo. Raniero's external goal is to fulfill his duties in the village and maintain his reputation as a reliable and respected member of the community. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the tension between power, loyalty, and morality within the church hierarchy. This conflict challenges the characters' beliefs in fairness, justice, and integrity. |
Character Development Contribution: The goals and conflicts contribute to the character's development by forcing them to confront their values, make difficult decisions, and evolve in their beliefs and principles.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative structure of the screenplay by creating tension, conflict, and resolution that propel the story forward and keep the audience engaged.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts deepen the thematic exploration of power, morality, loyalty, and the pursuit of justice within a complex political and religious landscape, adding layers of complexity and depth to the screenplay's overarching themes.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - The Passing of Pope Clement IV Improve | Serious, Reflective, Ironic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
2 - Morning Interactions Improve | Tender, Playful, Warm | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 2 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - A Day in Viterbo Improve | Playful, Warm, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7.5 | 4 | 8 | 3 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Preparations for Important Guests Improve | Formal, Humorous, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Celebration and Tension in Viterbo Cathedral Improve | Formal, Humorous, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - The Cardinals' Dinner Improve | Tense, Playful, Romantic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - The Papal Election Improve | Tense, Serious, Contentious, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - A Failed Election and Family Tensions Improve | Tense, Reflective, Family-oriented, Regretful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - The Escape Improve | Tense, Humorous, Authoritative | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Covert Actions in the Cathedral Improve | Suspenseful, Intriguing, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Family Matters and Secrecy Improve | Serious, Tense, Family-oriented, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
12 - Interrogation in the Dungeon Improve | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
13 - Royal Strategy Improve | Tense, Calculating, Authoritative | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Tensions in the Town Square Improve | Serious, Tense, Defeated, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Searching for Answers Improve | Tension, Frustration, Disappointment, Weariness | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Interrupted Passion and a Generous Offer Improve | Passionate, Tender, Playful | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Tensions in Viterbo Town Square Improve | Tense, Resentful, Defiant, Desperate | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - The Delegation from King Charles Improve | Tense, Serious, Intriguing, Formal | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - The Cardinal's Ultimatum Improve | Intense, Threatening, Tense, Contemplative | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - The Papal Election Discussion Improve | Tense, Hopeful, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - The Villagers' Protest Improve | Tense, Serious, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Oath of Secrecy Improve | Tense, Serious, Regretful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
23 - Standoff in the Market Square Improve | Tense, Confrontational, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Whipping and Confessions Improve | Tense, Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - The Death of Cardinal Pironti Improve | Somber, Tense, Reflective | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
26 - Turmoil and Joy at the Thermal Baths Improve | Serious, Reflective, Tense, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - The Knights' Obstacle Improve | Tense, Dramatic, Confrontational, Resolute | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Confrontation in the Medieval City Improve | Tense, Defiant, Resolute, Somber | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
29 - Sleepless Night at the Papal Palace Improve | Tense, Somber, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Interrogation at Podesta Palace Improve | Menacing, Suspenseful, Intense, Conspiratorial | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
31 - Confrontation at the Gates of Viterbo Improve | Tense, Confrontational, Defiant, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Power Struggles and Tensions Improve | Tense, Serious, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Family Concerns and Drastic Solutions Improve | Somber, Reflective, Hopeful | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Roof Repairs and Royal Plans Improve | Tense, Serious, Intriguing, Hopeful, Humorous | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
35 - The Interdict of Viterbo Improve | Tense, Emotional, Serious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
36 - Taking Responsibility Improve | Somber, Compassionate, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 4 | 8 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - The Excommunication Decision Improve | Tense, Defiant, Resolute, Somber | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
38 - The Church Bells and the Confession Improve | Desperate, Emotional, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - The Election of the New Holy Father Improve | Serious, Tense, Hopeful | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
40 - The Election of Teobaldo Visconti Improve | Joyful, Hopeful, Solemn | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
41 - The Announcement of the New Pope Improve | Joyful, Reverent, Emotional, Serene | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Reconciliation and Baptism Improve | Serious, Emotional, Reverent, Hopeful | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Engaging dialogue
- Strong character development
- Emotional depth
- Tension-building
- Effective conflict
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited emotional depth
- Limited character development
- Some predictable elements
- Lack of external conflict
- Heavy exposition
Suggestions
- Explore more nuanced character interactions and motivations to heighten emotional depth
- Develop secondary characters to add more dimension to the story
- Avoid predictable plot points and cliched dialogue exchanges
- Incorporate more external conflict and action to balance out dialogue-heavy scenes
- Find ways to convey necessary exposition more subtly and through action rather than dialogue
- Physical environment: The screenplay depicts a medieval world with various settings such as a countryside, town square, Papal Palace, cathedral, and tavern. The physical characteristics include lush landscapes, stone walls, cobblestone streets, grand interiors, and medieval architecture.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay include references to Cardinals, Bishops, Papal Guards, knights, and religious figures. There are also depictions of family dynamics, gender roles, daily routines, and traditional celebrations. The society is deeply rooted in religious beliefs, hierarchy, and power struggles.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is hierarchical, with characters like Cardinals, mayors, knights, and city officials holding positions of power and influence. There are clear divisions between the powerful and the common folk, as well as tensions and conflicts within the community.
- Technology: The technological aspects in the screenplay are minimal, reflecting a historical setting. The primary modes of transportation are horseback travel, and communication is done through messengers, notes, and basic tools. Traditional methods of communication and decision-making are emphasized.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by influencing their interactions, decisions, and relationships. The hierarchical society and power dynamics affect how characters navigate their roles and responsibilities within the community.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay by creating a sense of historical authenticity, grandeur, and tension. The physical environment, cultural elements, societal structure, and technological aspects set the stage for the characters' conflicts, alliances, and struggles for power.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of tradition, power, loyalty, betrayal, duty, and personal relationships. The tensions between different social classes, the influence of religion on society, and the political intrigue within the community add layers of complexity to the narrative.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by rich descriptive language, historical authenticity, subtle humor, and a blend of warmth and authority in dialogue. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice enhances the mood, themes, and depth of the screenplay by creating a vivid and immersive historical setting, developing complex character dynamics, and exploring themes of power, morality, and family relationships. |
Best Representation Scene | 13 - Royal Strategy |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it effectively conveys the historical setting, the characters' motivations, and the political tensions through eloquent dialogue and descriptive language. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Positive correlation between Emotional Impact and Overall Grade | Scenes with higher emotional impact tend to have higher overall grades, indicating that emotional depth enhances the quality of the scene. |
Negative correlation between Dialogue and Emotional Impact | Scenes with higher dialogue scores tend to have lower emotional impact scores, suggesting that excessive dialogue may detract from the emotional resonance of a scene. |
Positive correlation between Conflict and High Stakes | Scenes with higher conflict scores also tend to have higher stakes, indicating that intense conflicts are often associated with significant consequences for the characters. |
Positive correlation between Character Changes and Emotional Impact | Scenes with more significant character changes tend to have higher emotional impact scores, suggesting that character growth and development can enhance the emotional resonance of a scene. |
Negative correlation between Tone and Conflict | Scenes with more serious or reflective tones tend to have lower conflict scores, indicating that a somber or introspective tone may not always align with high levels of conflict. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates a strong foundation in creating engaging narratives with rich character dynamics, emotional depth, and thematic complexity. The writer excels in blending historical detail with compelling storytelling, creating immersive worlds that captivate the audience.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Read 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder to further develop scene structure, character arcs, and thematic depth. | This book provides valuable insights into crafting compelling scenes, developing character-driven narratives, and enhancing thematic resonance, aligning with the key improvement areas identified in the screenplay analysis. |
Exercise | Practice writing dialogue-driven scenes with conflicting character motivations to deepen emotional complexity.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will help the writer hone their skills in creating dynamic character interactions, exploring underlying tensions, and enhancing the authenticity of the characters' voices, addressing the key improvement area of dialogue and character development. |
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Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Election Drama | The screenplay revolves around the election of a new Pope, with various characters involved in the process and the tensions that arise. | This trope is commonly seen in movies and TV shows where there is a power struggle or competition for a leadership position. An example of this trope is seen in the TV show 'House of Cards' where characters engage in political maneuvering and backstabbing to secure positions of power. |
Family Dynamics | The screenplay explores the dynamics within Raniero's family, including interactions between him, his wife, and his daughters. | Family dynamics are a common trope in storytelling, showcasing the relationships and conflicts within a family unit. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'Little Miss Sunshine' where a dysfunctional family goes on a road trip together, leading to humorous and heartfelt moments. |
Political Intrigue | The screenplay involves political intrigue as characters navigate alliances, secrets, and power struggles. | Political intrigue is a common trope in stories involving politics or power dynamics, where characters engage in manipulation, deception, and strategic planning. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'The Departed' where characters in law enforcement and organized crime engage in a complex web of deceit and betrayal. |
Power Struggle | The screenplay depicts a power struggle among the Cardinals vying for the position of Pope, as well as the tensions between different factions. | A power struggle is a common trope in stories where characters compete for control, influence, or authority. An example of this trope is seen in the TV show 'Game of Thrones' where various factions vie for the Iron Throne, leading to betrayals and conflicts. |
Betrayal | The screenplay involves instances of betrayal, such as characters revealing secrets or turning against each other. | Betrayal is a common trope in storytelling where characters deceive or harm others for personal gain or hidden motives. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'The Godfather' where characters betray their family members and allies for power and survival. |
Secrets and Intrigue | The screenplay involves characters keeping and uncovering secrets, leading to tension and conflict. | Secrets and intrigue are common tropes in stories where characters hide information or motives, leading to suspense and mystery. An example of this trope is seen in the TV show 'Sherlock' where the titular detective unravels complex mysteries and uncovers hidden truths. |
Character Redemption | The screenplay involves characters seeking redemption for past actions or mistakes. | Character redemption is a common trope in storytelling where characters strive to atone for their past sins or wrongdoings. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'Les Misérables' where the protagonist seeks redemption through acts of kindness and sacrifice. |
Religious Conflict | The screenplay involves religious conflict, such as the interdict placed on the town of Viterbo and the excommunication of Raniero. | Religious conflict is a common trope in stories where characters clash over beliefs, practices, or authority within a religious context. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'The Da Vinci Code' where characters uncover secrets that challenge established religious beliefs. |
Character Growth | The screenplay depicts characters experiencing personal growth and change throughout the story. | Character growth is a common trope in storytelling where characters evolve, learn from their experiences, and develop as individuals. An example of this trope is seen in the TV show 'Breaking Bad' where the protagonist undergoes a transformation from a mild-mannered teacher to a ruthless drug lord. |
Community Unity | The screenplay involves the townspeople of Viterbo coming together in times of crisis and uncertainty. | Community unity is a common trope in stories where characters overcome differences and band together for a common cause. An example of this trope is seen in the movie 'Remember the Titans' where a diverse group of high school students unite to overcome racial tensions and achieve success in football. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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4 | MAYOR MONTEBUONO: Recognition is the ultimate honor to which a man can aspire, and I am prepared to soar into its embrace... is there any reason for concern? I want to ensure everything proceeds as planned. |
18 | Raniero: I am Raniero Gatti, Captain of the people. |
12 | King Charles: Ah, the sweet melody of justice, played on the strings of pain. |
14 | Mayor Montebuono: A small sacrifice on our part, and we gain abundantly. You wouldn’t want to disrupt that, would you? |
41 | Father Luzio: Today, we gather to welcome this child into the embrace of our faith. May his journey be guided by the light of God's love... |
Some Loglines to consider:
When a prolonged Papal election plunges the Italian town of Viterbo into crisis, the Captain of the town, Raniero Gatti, must navigate a web of political intrigue, power struggles, and the resilience of his community to bring about a resolution. |
In 13th-century Italy, a town's Captain risks everything to ensure a swift end to the longest Papal election in history, battling political factions, the King of France, and even the wrath of the Church to protect his community. |
A historical drama that explores the consequences of ambition and the power of community, as a 13th-century Italian town becomes the backdrop for a high-stakes Papal election that tests the limits of its citizens' loyalty and resilience. |
Caught in the crosshairs of a prolonged Papal election, the Captain of a struggling Italian town must make difficult choices that challenge his faith and divide his community, in this captivating historical drama. |
In a 13th-century Italian town, a captain's fight to end a drawn-out Papal election spirals into a battle for the soul of his community, as political machinations, personal sacrifices, and a clash of ideals play out on a grand stage. |
In 1268, a small Italian town becomes the epicenter of political intrigue and moral dilemmas as the longest papal conclave in history unfolds. |
Amidst political machinations and personal sacrifices, a determined captain and a group of Cardinals navigate the treacherous waters of the longest papal conclave in history. |
As the Church faces its greatest crisis, a small town's captain must balance duty and faith to bring an end to the longest papal conclave in history. |
In a tale of power, faith, and sacrifice, the longest papal conclave in history tests the resolve of a small town and its determined captain. |
Set against the backdrop of the longest papal conclave in history, a captain's unwavering commitment to justice and faith leads to a transformative journey for a small Italian town. |
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Explanation: The feature screenplay 'A Conclave of Scoundrels' is a historical drama that skillfully blends high-stakes political intrigue, complex character arcs, and a richly detailed depiction of the town of Viterbo during a prolonged Papal election. The script offers a compelling narrative that explores the consequences of ambition, the dynamics of power, and the resilience of a community facing adversity. With its strong thematic underpinnings, well-developed characters, and impressive attention to historical accuracy, the screenplay presents a unique and compelling story that would appeal to audiences interested in period dramas, political sagas, and character-driven narratives.
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Explanation: A Conclave Of Scoundrels is a historical drama set in 1268, revolving around the longest papal conclave in history. The screenplay excels in character development, historical accuracy, and thematic depth. However, it suffers from pacing issues and occasional inconsistencies in tone. The narrative is compelling, but it could benefit from tighter editing and more focused storytelling.