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Scene Map 41
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT SMALL CAR.
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INT CAR (CONT'D)
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INT CAR
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EXT TRAFFIC LIGHTS.. LATE AFTERNOON.
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EXT PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - SIDE VIEW OF SMALL CAR AS
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INT LIVING ROOM OF PARTY HOUSE IN THE PALISADES.
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EXT POOL SIDE - LARGE, FLOWING GARDEN WITH FOUNTAINS,
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INT MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
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INT LIVING ROOM
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EXT DRIVEWAY
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EXT DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
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INT COMPACT CAR OF WONDER WOMAN. HEADING DOWN THE A
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EXT SIDE OF PCH. PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE. A
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INT OF WONDERWOMAN'S CAR.
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB - CLOSED - NIGHT - NOT A SOUL
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EXT SIDE OF PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY A HALF MILE AWAY FROM
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EXT SIDE OF ROAD APPROACHING CAMP GATE NIGHT
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT - LAUNCH AREA NEAR A DROP
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EXT DOCKSIDE NIGHT
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EXT BOATS AT DOCK NIGHT
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
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EXT MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE NIGHT
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EXT NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
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EXT DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING
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EXT OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MOONLIT
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INT MAIN BUILDING - BACK ROOM - LOW LIGHTING
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
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INT SAME HALL IN MAIN BUILDING.. DOOR OF ONE ROOM OVER.
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INT NEXT ROOM OVER
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
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INT JULIO'S DAD'S WORK DESK IN THE HOME IN THE
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EXT DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
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INT SILENT - APC
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INT BACK ROOM
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EXT SAME BUSY INTERSECTION WHERE JOHN/AQUAMAN WAS PICKED
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EXT BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS. SAME DAY. SUNLIT,
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INT BUS AT REAR
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
INT SMALL CAR.
INT. SMALL CAR.
OPENING SHOT - EXT. DAY Extreme close up of Starbucks Siren logo on side of a grande' coffee. We see corner of the order sticker and a Sharpie "Enjoy!" with a smiley face in the "O". There is a dried streak of coffee down the side.
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INT CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D) WONDER WOMAN Don't think I don't appreciate the irony. You lost the toss again for Superman?
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INT CAR
INT. CAR
INT. CAR WONDER WOMAN Ya, ya... I'm late already...I know. No gratitude. She slows the car and pulls up. SUPERMAN gets into the
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EXT TRAFFIC LIGHTS.. LATE AFTERNOON.
EXT. TRAFFIC LIGHTS.. LATE AFTERNOON.
EXT. TRAFFIC LIGHTS.. LATE AFTERNOON. We see WONDER WOMAN'S car pull up to a red light. There is a movie shoot going on.. extras in costume eating Craft bagels, and sipping coffee. In the background, we see a lifesize portion of the Acropolis, Athena columns
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EXT PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - SIDE VIEW OF SMALL CAR AS
EXT. PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - SIDE VIEW OF SMALL CAR AS
EXT. PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - SIDE VIEW OF SMALL CAR AS OUR HEROES PILE OUT. SUPERMAN is preening his cowlick, AQUAMAN sniffs his pits and WONDER WOMAN is doing a last check in a compact mirror. She immediately notices the wide brim sunglasses
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INT LIVING ROOM OF PARTY HOUSE IN THE PALISADES.
INT. LIVING ROOM OF PARTY HOUSE IN THE PALISADES.
INT. LIVING ROOM OF PARTY HOUSE IN THE PALISADES. BALLOONS, PARTY FAVORITES, CAKE AND CHIPS, ETC. (BUT IT LOOKS LIKE THE MARIE CELESTE) A man is being attended to by his terrified wife... he's been worked over. She is still working on restraints that
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EXT POOL SIDE - LARGE, FLOWING GARDEN WITH FOUNTAINS,
EXT. POOL SIDE - LARGE, FLOWING GARDEN WITH FOUNTAINS,
EXT. POOL SIDE - LARGE, FLOWING GARDEN WITH FOUNTAINS, HEDGES, OUTBUILDING, BIG POOL AND CABANA. THERE IS AN ICE SCULPTURE OF THE MEXICAN NATIONAL SYMBOL OF THE EAGLE DEVOURING THE SNAKE.. MELTING, DRIPPING IN THE SUN AT THE END OF A LONG TABLE FULL OF FOOD.
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INT MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
INT. MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
INT. MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK The door cracks and light spills in. AQUAMAN sticks his head in professionally for a look before committing. Seems OK... he cracks the door some more and steps in, flicks on the light.
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INT LIVING ROOM
INT. LIVING ROOM
INT. LIVING ROOM SUPERMAN steps back in from the kitchen. WONDER WOMAN is getting nowhere with the parents.. frustrated. They are refusing to answer anything, shaking their heads forcefully against any questions and gesturing strongly
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EXT DRIVEWAY
EXT. DRIVEWAY
EXT. DRIVEWAY SUPERMAN AND WONDER WOMAN exit the door onto the driveway to find AQUAMAN waiting with the radios in his hand and his trident leaning against the garage. They scrum. AQUAMAN
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EXT DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
EXT. DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
EXT. DRIVEWAY (CONT'D) AQUAMAN But I am still kinda worried about all the irony. WONDER WOMAN
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INT COMPACT CAR OF WONDER WOMAN. HEADING DOWN THE A
INT. COMPACT CAR OF WONDER WOMAN. HEADING DOWN THE A
INT. COMPACT CAR OF WONDER WOMAN. HEADING DOWN THE A STEEP ROAD OUT OF THE PALISADES AND ONTO THE PCH. WONDER WOMAN starts shifting gears hard to accelerate. WONDER WOMAN They still on the highway?
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EXT SIDE OF PCH. PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE. A
EXT. SIDE OF PCH. PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE. A
EXT. SIDE OF PCH. PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE. A HANDPAINTED SIGN WITH AN AIRFIELD NAME, A SWINGING SIGN BELOW THAT SAYS "HOLLYWOOD HANG GLIDING CLUB". Small car pulls into shot and SUPERMAN gets out. A moment
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INT OF WONDERWOMAN'S CAR.
INT. OF WONDERWOMAN'S CAR.
INT. OF WONDERWOMAN'S CAR. They are looking off at Clark moving away. Radio squawks. SUPERMAN(V.O. RADIO) Radio check. Golden Lasso.. come in.
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB - CLOSED - NIGHT - NOT A SOUL
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - CLOSED - NIGHT - NOT A SOUL
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - CLOSED - NIGHT - NOT A SOUL ABOUT. Open air hangar and storage. There are some gliders tied down. SUPERMAN enters the shot, looks down the line of hang gliders. A raven flies through cawwing and lands on
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EXT SIDE OF PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY A HALF MILE AWAY FROM
EXT. SIDE OF PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY A HALF MILE AWAY FROM
EXT. SIDE OF PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY A HALF MILE AWAY FROM GATE.. SOME EUCALYPTUS AND PINES. WONDER WOMAN'S car pulls into shot and off the road using the trees as cover. They exit the car. AQUAMAN is still carrying his trident purposefully. WONDER WOMAN eyes the
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EXT SIDE OF ROAD APPROACHING CAMP GATE NIGHT
EXT. SIDE OF ROAD APPROACHING CAMP GATE - NIGHT
EXT. SIDE OF ROAD APPROACHING CAMP GATE - NIGHT WONDER WOMAN.. skipping more than jogging in her heeled, authentic WW boots. She grimaces and wobbles at the effort occasionally. She arrives at the camp gate. Takes up position behind some scrub. The guard booth at the
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT - LAUNCH AREA NEAR A DROP
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT - LAUNCH AREA NEAR A DROP
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT - LAUNCH AREA NEAR A DROP OFF SUPERMAN WALKS INTO SHOT CARRYING BLACK HANG GLIDER. He gently sets it down and steps out, looking down at his take off point... fifty yards of ground followed by a
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EXT DOCKSIDE NIGHT
EXT. DOCKSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. DOCKSIDE - NIGHT He moves along, carrying the steel trident like a weapon, and hops quietly into each KIDDIE BOAT, checking the battery charge. First boat... a fiberglass My Little Pony.Indicator shows
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EXT BOATS AT DOCK NIGHT
EXT. BOATS AT DOCK - NIGHT
EXT. BOATS AT DOCK - NIGHT AQUAMAN checks his watch, unties the boat and throws rope in...he grabs the little kiddie steering wheel and flips a switch. The little boat begins to putter along silently. He turns and approaches POV from the front.
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT (2 beats) then.. CUT TO: Cell phone aerial map zoomed in. We see the AirTag location pulsing slowly on the building in the map. A
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING We see the poor kid, apparently locked in a room, bound to a chair by a window, moonlight streaming in. He has been crying, is a lonely, desperate mess. He has a habit of looking out the window onto the lake to see if any
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EXT MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE NIGHT
EXT. MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE - NIGHT
EXT. MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE - NIGHT GUARD is sitting on the steps watching Shakira videos on his phone. We hear the shitty speaker music spilling into the night. He takes another swig from the bottle. As he
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EXT NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
EXT. NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
EXT. NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE Burst hits the guy in the chest, shattering the bottle. Guy keels over, drops the phone. It continues playing the Shakira song obliviously. CUT TO:
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT WONDER WOMAN is already underway. She is making a good, professional clip, has her weapon pointed skyward in good training form. She gets to the main door of the building, checks the fire window.. scans about and opens it, steps
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EXT DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING
EXT. DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING
EXT. DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING CARTEL GUY still postured for a shot but.. We hear the ting of steel in flight and the trident nails the guy's hand to the post. He screams.
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EXT OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MOONLIT
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MOONLIT
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MOONLIT SUPERMAN is in flight, hovering above and over from AQUAMAN in moving boat. SUPERMAN hovers 15 feet up and over from the little boat.
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INT MAIN BUILDING - BACK ROOM - LOW LIGHTING
INT. MAIN BUILDING - BACK ROOM - LOW LIGHTING
INT. MAIN BUILDING - BACK ROOM - LOW LIGHTING WE see the boy tied in chair. He hears some of the activity outside and leans his head to look out the small window. CLARK/SUPERMAN flies into view just in front of the
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON. Last GUARD is sitting with his back to the door, smiling at a George Michael video, bopping his head lightly like a doofus, oblivious to his nemesis on the other side of the door.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON. The CARTEL GUY starts coming to. He looks up at ANNIE.. blinks hard, then down at the golden rope wrapped several times around his body... shakes his head.. looks back up at ANNIE.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON.
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING - LIGHTS ON. ANNIE (eyes wide, shock) What the Holy fuck, Elvis!!!? Jeesus!
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INT SAME HALL IN MAIN BUILDING.. DOOR OF ONE ROOM OVER.
INT. SAME HALL IN MAIN BUILDING.. DOOR OF ONE ROOM OVER.
INT. SAME HALL IN MAIN BUILDING.. DOOR OF ONE ROOM OVER. Our heroes arrive and gather in front. WONDER WOMAN tries the door just in case.. The door is locked. ANNIE Damn! It's locked... just like
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INT NEXT ROOM OVER
INT. NEXT ROOM OVER
INT. NEXT ROOM OVER We see the lad utterly apprehensive, ecstatic about his rescue. Eyes wide, big smile. The door gives way in a flurry of door jam wood, flying splinters in slo mo. Our heroes enter professionally in a
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING SUPERMAN/CLARK impressed, bends slightly in a respectful posture and extends his hand in a grown up gesture, man to man. SUPERMAN/CLARK
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INT JULIO'S DAD'S WORK DESK IN THE HOME IN THE
INT. JULIO'S DAD'S WORK DESK IN THE HOME IN THE
INT. JULIO'S DAD'S WORK DESK IN THE HOME IN THE PALISADES.(FLASHBACK) Julio's Dad is at his PC, waves young Julio over.. starts scrolling through the head shots and action photos of our heroes on the agency website. JULIO gets excited.. his
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EXT DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
EXT. DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
EXT. DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK) JOHN/AQUAMAN sitting roadside in Afghanistan, both eyes bandaged, being attended to by a medic. Stunned, shocked look.. distant. JULIO (V.O.)
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INT SILENT - APC
INT. SILENT - APC
INT. SILENT - APC CLARK pulls back, registers something, some concern..like the bird has tipped him off somehow...an old infantry myth/legend. Very brief. Turns around quickly, opens his mouth to shout..
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INT BACK ROOM
INT. BACK ROOM
INT. BACK ROOM At this point, they all have pretty floored expressions. JULIO continues... JULIO I know.. I'm a kid.. but I'm not a
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EXT SAME BUSY INTERSECTION WHERE JOHN/AQUAMAN WAS PICKED
EXT. SAME BUSY INTERSECTION WHERE JOHN/AQUAMAN WAS PICKED
EXT. SAME BUSY INTERSECTION WHERE JOHN/AQUAMAN WAS PICKED UP BY ANNIE/WONDER WOMAN IN THE FIRST SCENE. SUNNY.. A PERFECT DAY. MORE BIRDSONG, LESS INDUSTRIAL. The same 2 homeless veterans are on their favorite bench in fatigue jackets chatting it up. Their conversation
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EXT BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS. SAME DAY. SUNLIT,
EXT. BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS. SAME DAY. SUNLIT,
EXT. BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS. SAME DAY. SUNLIT, BIRDSONG, ETC. CLARK/SUPERMAN is in full costume, sitting waiting for a bus on a bench, heading out for a solo gig. Bus pulls up and SUPERMAN attempts to stand. There is a slight
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INT BUS AT REAR
INT. BUS AT REAR
INT. BUS AT REAR They are wide eyed, excited in response. One kid produces a comic book, whispers to his Mom. She produces a marker from her purse, gestures to him to go ahead, gives permission. The kid walks toward SUPERMAN O.S.

The Ivanhoe Gig

When a cartel kidnaps a boy during his communion, three down-and-out veteran actors—dressed as Aquaman, Wonder Woman and Superman—must turn improvised props and vandalized dignity into real heroism to find him; along the way, the mundane (a swallowed AirTag, a plastic trident, a hang glider) reveals a new kind of sacrament.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script uniquely blends superhero genre conventions with veteran trauma, media theory (McLuhan), and spiritual symbolism, creating an intelligent exploration of how modern technology flattens ancient archetypes while allowing them to re-emerge through unexpected channels. Unlike typical superhero stories, it's grounded in the mundane reality of struggling veterans while elevating their actions through mythic resonance. The concept of 'media-archeological rescue'—where costumes become vestments and digital tracking becomes sacramental—offers fresh commentary on our Marvel-weary age.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
Gemini
 Highly Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.4
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate your script, focus on refining its craft by addressing key areas like inconsistent formatting and pacing issues in the middle act, which could distract from your strong thematic elements. Sharpen antagonist motivations and stakes for clearer tension, and integrate character backstories more organically to avoid exposition dumps, ensuring your innovative blend of media theory and veteran redemption resonates even more powerfully with audiences.
For Executives:
This script offers solid value as a unique, low-budget indie project with strong festival potential due to its thematic depth and character-driven action, appealing to arthouse crowds through its media theory and veteran motifs. However, risks include amateurish formatting that could signal inexperience, pacing lags in the middle act that might bore viewers, and vague antagonist development reducing tension, potentially limiting broader commercial appeal and making it a harder sell without revisions.
Story Facts
Genres:
Action 45% Crime 25% Drama 50% Comedy 15% Thriller 30% War 10%

Setting: Contemporary, Primarily in the Palisades area of Los Angeles, California, with scenes in urban settings, a hang gliding club, and a camp.

Themes: Reclamation of Archetypal Heroism through the Mundane, Media and Communication's Influence on Identity and Reality, Syncretism and the Interplay of Faith, Myth, and Culture, The Weight of Past Trauma and the Path to Redemption, The Blurring Lines Between Performance and Authenticity, The Power of Hope and Faith in Adversity

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around the kidnapping of a boy by cartel members, with the stakes being the boy's safety and the heroes' struggle to confront their pasts while working together to rescue him.

Mood: A mix of humorous irony and poignant melancholy, balancing lighthearted moments with serious themes.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The blend of superhero action with real-life issues such as addiction and PTSD, providing a fresh take on the genre.
  • Character Depth: The exploration of the heroes' vulnerabilities and past military experiences adds emotional weight to the story.
  • Humor and Irony: The use of humor in serious situations creates a unique tone that balances action with lighthearted moments.
  • Social Commentary: The screenplay addresses societal issues like homelessness and addiction, making it relevant and thought-provoking.

Comparable Scripts: The Boys, Superhero Movie, Deadpool, The Tick, The Incredibles, Watchmen, Mystery Men, Kick-Ass, Guardians of the Galaxy

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.8
Typical rewrite gain: +0.7 in Conflict (Script Level)
Gets you ~10% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~687 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Conflict (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.7 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Theme (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Theme (Script Level)
Gets you ~6% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~1,521 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Scene Structure
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Scene Structure score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.32 in Scene Structure
Gets you ~6% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,311 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Scene Structure by about +0.32 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.06
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script's creative and craft elements, prioritize developing the antagonists with clearer motivations and backstories to heighten conflict and emotional stakes. Additionally, refine pacing in the middle sections by streamlining dialogue and interactions, ensuring smoother transitions and sustained tension. These adjustments will enhance character depth, thematic clarity, and overall audience engagement, making the narrative more impactful and resonant.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively blends humor, action, and themes of veteran struggles with superhero archetypes, but to enhance its craft, focus on refining pacing and transitions for a smoother narrative flow. Strengthening the balance between comedic elements and emotional depth will deepen character arcs and thematic resonance, ensuring that symbolic motifs like the butterfly serve the story without overwhelming the audience, ultimately making the screenplay more polished and engaging.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analyses highlight strong military backstories and heroic arcs for Aquaman, Wonder Woman, and Superman, but the script can be improved by deepening emotional vulnerabilities, such as through targeted flashbacks and more nuanced dialogue, especially in early scenes like scene 3. Focusing on these elements will enhance character relatability, strengthen arcs, and create a more engaging narrative that resonates with themes of identity and redemption, ultimately elevating the story's emotional depth and audience connection.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The emotional analysis highlights that while the script has strong moments of variety and intensity, it suffers from clustered emotional tones and prolonged high-suspense sequences that risk audience fatigue. To enhance the craft, focus on integrating more emotional contrast, such as brief moments of humor or reflection within action scenes, and deepen character empathy by showing layered responses to trauma and growth, ensuring a more balanced and resonant narrative that avoids repetitive intensity and fosters deeper audience connection.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its character-driven narrative and thematic depth, particularly in exploring the philosophical conflict between duty and personal vulnerability. To enhance the craft, focus on tightening the emotional arcs in key scenes, such as the rescue and denouement, to ensure that internal goal resolutions feel more organic and impactful, avoiding any sense of abruptness in character transformations. This will deepen audience empathy and make the themes of heroism and redemption more resonant, potentially by adding subtle moments of introspection or dialogue that reinforce the characters' growth.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strong emphasis on reclaiming archetypal heroism through everyday elements is a compelling hook, but to enhance its craft, focus on deepening the characters' emotional arcs and ensuring symbolic motifs like the white butterfly and syncretic elements feel authentically woven into the narrative rather than contrived. This will amplify the themes' resonance, improve pacing in quieter moments, and avoid potential clichés in the redemption storyline, making the story more impactful and relatable for audiences.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively uses symbolic elements and archetypes to explore themes of redemption and veteran struggles, but inconsistencies in character development, such as abrupt shifts in motivation, and minor plot holes could undermine its emotional depth. To enhance craft, focus on smoothing character arcs with subtle internal cues and addressing redundancies in dialogue and symbolism to create a more organic and engaging narrative flow, ensuring the mundane grace shines through without feeling forced.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The writer's voice is a strong asset, blending symbolism and absurdity effectively, but to improve the script, focus on ensuring that the symbolic elements are more accessible and integrated without overshadowing the plot or character development. By refining moments of high-concept exploration, such as the use of archetypes and media theory, to include clearer emotional anchors, the narrative can achieve greater balance, making it more engaging and resonant for audiences while preserving its unique, witty essence.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay excels in its innovative blend of humor, action, and symbolic depth, but to enhance its craft, focus on technical refinements like improving formatting for better readability and visual flow, while deepening character development and dialogue to explore internal conflicts and subtext more profoundly. Addressing pacing issues will help maintain tension, and leveraging suggested resources, such as 'Save the Cat!' for structure and targeted exercises for emotional depth, can transform the script into a more polished and resonant piece.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building masterfully integrates everyday realism with fantastical elements to create a compelling, surreal atmosphere that enhances character depth and narrative drive. To improve creatively, focus on refining the symbolic motifs, such as the white butterfly and raven, to ensure they emerge naturally from the story rather than feeling forced, thereby amplifying emotional stakes and avoiding genre clichés, which could make the script more impactful and resonant for audiences.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script excels in using sarcasm and high-quality dialogue to add emotional depth, but to enhance its craft, focus on refining tone shifts and pacing to prevent lulls in the latter half, ensuring that the progression from cynicism to heroism remains engaging without diluting tension. Additionally, balance mystery-driven suspense with humorous relief to maintain character arcs and audience investment, leveraging symbolic elements like the raven or butterfly more strategically for cumulative impact.
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Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (4)
  • Visual Imagery - symbolismMotifs: 6.0 → 9.0 +3.0
  • Visual Imagery - creativity: 7.0 → 9.0 +2.0
  • Premise - premiseDepth: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Conflict - conflictIntegration: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected