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1 EXT. MIDWEST COUNTRYSIDE - EARLY MORNING 1
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6 INT. A HALLWAY IN HER HOME - DAY 6
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8 EXT. A NIGHT SKY - EVENING 8
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9 INT. A DESK - DAY 9
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12 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD - AFTERNOON 12
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14 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT COTTONWOOD TREE - AFTERNOON 14
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16 EXT. A LARGE OPEN PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 16
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20 EXT. OUTSIDE OF A SETTLEMENT - AFTERNOON 20
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21 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN STREET - DAY 21
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22 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 22
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23 EXT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 23
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24 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 24
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25 EXT. OUTSIDE GENERAL STORE - AFTERNOON 25
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26 INT. PAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 26
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27 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 27
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28 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - NEXT MORNING 28
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29 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE MORNING 29
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32 EXT. A FIELD - DAY 32
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34 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - NOON 34
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35 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - MAIN ENTRANCE - AFTERNOON 35
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37 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - AFTERNOON 37
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38 INT. TRIBE COMMAND TENT - AFTERNOON 38
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40 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE 40
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41 INT. TRIBE CAMP RECRUIT TENT - NIGHT 41
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42 EXT. TRIBE CAMP AUXILLARY GATE - NIGHT 42
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43 INT. TRIBE CAMP SUPPLY TENT - NEXT MORNING 43
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46 EXT. PRAIRIE CREEK - MORNING 46
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47 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD WITH A HILL TRIBE SIDE - DAY 47
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49 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - MORNING 49
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50 EXT. PRAIRIE - TRANSITION 50
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52 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 52
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53 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 53
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54 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 54
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55 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 55
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57 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 57
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58 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 58
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59 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 59
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61 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 61
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62 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN GATE - LATE AFTERNOON 62
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63 EXT. PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 63
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65 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 65
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66 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 66
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69 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT TREE - AFTERNOON 69
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# PG SLUGLINE
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1 EXT. MIDWEST COUNTRYSIDE - EARLY MORNING 1
1 EXT. MIDWEST COUNTRYSIDE - EARLY MORNING 1
1 EXT. MIDWEST COUNTRYSIDE - EARLY MORNING 1 CORN FIELDS line the horizon below a clear blue sky. SUPER: Summer 2016 - Central Illinois 2 INT. A BEDROOM - MORNING 2 EYES snap wide open on a man's face.
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6 INT. A HALLWAY IN HER HOME - DAY 6
6 INT. A HALLWAY IN HER HOME - DAY 6
6 INT. A HALLWAY IN HER HOME - DAY 6 A door to a bedroom sits partially open at the end of a long hallway. SEAMUS (V.O.) If there's one thing you can say
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8 EXT. A NIGHT SKY - EVENING 8
8 EXT. A NIGHT SKY - EVENING 8
8 EXT. A NIGHT SKY - EVENING 8 A clear night sky with a FULL MOON. We leave the moon and fade into the blackness of the night sky. SEAMUS (V.O.) Now I've been awake for days, I
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9 INT. A DESK - DAY 9
9 INT. A DESK - DAY 9
9 INT. A DESK - DAY 9 A woman's hand is writing on paper on a large wooden desk - a LETTER that we can't see the contents of as the pen continues to work. SEAMUS (V.O.)
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12 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD - AFTERNOON 12
12 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD - AFTERNOON 12
12 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD - AFTERNOON 12 Two legs, covered in pressed military slacks, take FOREBODING strides through tall grass, random blades of which are stained in BLOOD. We see the barrel of a RIFLE swing down by the legs for a moment.
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14 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT COTTONWOOD TREE - AFTERNOON 14
14 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT COTTONWOOD TREE - AFTERNOON 14
14 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT COTTONWOOD TREE - AFTERNOON 14 SEAMUS TOBIAS sits on a large tree branch that has grown into the ground in a grassy pasture. He takes a deep long DRAG from a PIPE. SUPER: Fall 2032 - Central Illinois
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16 EXT. A LARGE OPEN PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 16
16 EXT. A LARGE OPEN PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 16
16 EXT. A LARGE OPEN PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 16 SUPER: Spring 2019 A group of lost survivors are moving through tall prairie grass and they survey the scene, desperate and hungry. SEAMUS (V.O.)
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20 EXT. OUTSIDE OF A SETTLEMENT - AFTERNOON 20
20 EXT. OUTSIDE OF A SETTLEMENT - AFTERNOON 20
20 EXT. OUTSIDE OF A SETTLEMENT - AFTERNOON 20 Tall green PRAIRIE GRASS sways in a gentle breeze. SEAMUS (V.O.) Everything changed the day they came... The Tribe.
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21 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN STREET - DAY 21
21 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN STREET - DAY 21
21 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN STREET - DAY 21 Laura and Philip are walking and talking, their entourages following behind them. PHILIP SONTAG Laura, we all know what you put in
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22 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 22
22 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 22
22 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 22 SEAN sorts through odds and ends on some makeshift shelves. Dusty and dark, he stocks simple tools and trinkets alike. Roy and Angus enter the store. ANGUS
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23 EXT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 23
23 EXT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 23
23 EXT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 23 Roy and Angus are cutting wood behind the general store. Sweating and labored, they finish up their logs and take a break. ROY
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24 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 24
24 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 24
24 INT. GENERAL STORE PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 24 Sean sees a trader on his way as they store some wheat in the corner in bundles. Roy and Angus come in dirty and sweaty. ANGUS All done!
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25 EXT. OUTSIDE GENERAL STORE - AFTERNOON 25
25 EXT. OUTSIDE GENERAL STORE - AFTERNOON 25
25 EXT. OUTSIDE GENERAL STORE - AFTERNOON 25 As they walk out they slap each other's hands, shit eating grins on their faces. ROY / ANGUS (in unison)
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26 INT. PAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 26
26 INT. PAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 26
26 INT. PAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 26 Roy and Angus sit on their knees, hands tied, in the town hall of the Prairie Republic. Torches burn to light the room. Elevated at the front stands Laura Rosen next to her husband PRESIDENT ROSEN.
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27 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 27
27 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 27
27 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - EVENING 27 Brice and Hawkins stand in the hallway outside of a room quietly. Inside Laura is sitting next to President Josh Rosen as he lays down in a bed. She gently hugs him and gives him a kiss.
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28 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - NEXT MORNING 28
28 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - NEXT MORNING 28
28 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - NEXT MORNING 28 Roy and Angus and two other older men walk in a chain gang as Brice leads them on a horse to their exile. They slowly come upon a LARGE TREE by a small stream. Brice stops his horse and ties them off on a large branch.
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29 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE MORNING 29
29 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE MORNING 29
29 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE MORNING 29 Blurry eyed Angus looks up, the sun higher now. How long was he asleep? Dazed in that daylight nap, it's hard to see much. Two shadowy figures walk by above him as he is still half asleep.
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32 EXT. A FIELD - DAY 32
32 EXT. A FIELD - DAY 32
32 EXT. A FIELD - DAY 32 We see some skirmishes and small fights between Tribesman (shaved and in uniforms) and the locals. The locals have beards and mismatched outfits. A dozen men CLASH with make
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34 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - NOON 34
34 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - NOON 34
34 INT. PRAIRIE CITY TOWN HALL - NOON 34 Laura, Hawkins and her young assistant Jessica are in her office in the town hall back in the present day. SEAMUS (V.O.) But no one could have guessed what
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35 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - MAIN ENTRANCE - AFTERNOON 35
35 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - MAIN ENTRANCE - AFTERNOON 35
35 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - MAIN ENTRANCE - AFTERNOON 35 Rex and his caravan come upon the Tribe Camp with the boys. A massive fortification. Tall walls with small watchtowers and a large gate. It opens for the Colonel as they make their way in.
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37 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - AFTERNOON 37
37 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - AFTERNOON 37
37 EXT. TRIBE CAMP - AFTERNOON 37 Roy and Angus, clean shaven and washed up check each other out in their new Tribe uniforms. A few other new recruits stand near them as Oliver approaches.
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38 INT. TRIBE COMMAND TENT - AFTERNOON 38
38 INT. TRIBE COMMAND TENT - AFTERNOON 38
38 INT. TRIBE COMMAND TENT - AFTERNOON 38 A large table sits in part of the Tribe Command Tent. On the wall is adorned a beautiful TRIBE UNIFORM, stained in BLOOD with knife slashes through it. Oliver is nervously setting out glasses of water and
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40 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE 40
40 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE 40
40 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - LATE 40 AFTERNOON The Republic delegation is relaxing around a large tree by a stream.
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41 INT. TRIBE CAMP RECRUIT TENT - NIGHT 41
41 INT. TRIBE CAMP RECRUIT TENT - NIGHT 41
41 INT. TRIBE CAMP RECRUIT TENT - NIGHT 41 Roy and Angus lay next to each other in the tent. One of the other recruits is snoring loudly. The boys are whispering. ANGUS I regret everything.
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42 EXT. TRIBE CAMP AUXILLARY GATE - NIGHT 42
42 EXT. TRIBE CAMP AUXILLARY GATE - NIGHT 42
42 EXT. TRIBE CAMP AUXILLARY GATE - NIGHT 42 Two tribal guards walk past the small auxiliary gate, chatting. After the light of their torch has faded we see two figures slide the gate open just a hair and start to make their way out into the darkness.
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43 INT. TRIBE CAMP SUPPLY TENT - NEXT MORNING 43
43 INT. TRIBE CAMP SUPPLY TENT - NEXT MORNING 43
43 INT. TRIBE CAMP SUPPLY TENT - NEXT MORNING 43 Oliver, Colonel Mullens and Ethan stand in the LARGE TENT. Staring at the table where the BLACK BAGS lay. One of them missing leaving an open spot on the table. OLIVER
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46 EXT. PRAIRIE CREEK - MORNING 46
46 EXT. PRAIRIE CREEK - MORNING 46
46 EXT. PRAIRIE CREEK - MORNING 46 Roy and Angus lay low down by a creek out of sight. They are exhausted. Roy slings the heavy BLACK BAG off his back and starts to nap. Angus rolls over towards him. He opens the BLACK BAG to look
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47 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD WITH A HILL TRIBE SIDE - DAY 47
47 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD WITH A HILL TRIBE SIDE - DAY 47
47 EXT. A GRASSY FIELD WITH A HILL TRIBE SIDE - DAY 47 SUPER: Fall 2026 Viktor strides forth from the high ground dozens of yards away from the main battle line, the young Colonel Eric at his side.
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49 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - MORNING 49
49 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - MORNING 49
49 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - MORNING 49 Philip and Colonel Rex are in the middle of a field deep into their negotiations in present day. SEAMUS (V.O.)
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50 EXT. PRAIRIE - TRANSITION 50
50 EXT. PRAIRIE - TRANSITION 50
50 EXT. PRAIRIE - TRANSITION 50 We see the AFTERNOON turn into EVENING as the moon rises and falls to bring a new day to the countryside. FADE TO: 51 EXT. PRAIRIE BEYOND THE CREEK - MORNING 51
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52 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 52
52 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 52
52 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 52 Angus has a make shift sling on his left shoulder. Roy sits at a table with him and Linda. DENNIS THE FARMER
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53 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 53
53 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 53
53 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 53 Dennis is pacing in the kitchen, the boys sitting at the table with Linda. The bag lays open on the table in front of them.
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54 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 54
54 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 54
54 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - EVENING 54 The boys stand in front of a portrait painting on the wall of a young man. Linda holds a candle in front of it with Dennis next to her. Roy and Angus are AMAZED by the painting.
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55 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 55
55 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 55
55 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 55 Roy and Angus wake up, a good night's rest finally. Angus can move his shoulder a bit more but the pain is evident on his face. 56 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 56
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57 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 57
57 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 57
57 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - MORNING 57 Dennis points the way and gives directions to the boys. Linda gives them a hug, a careful one to Angus cause of his shoulder. They head off north from the house as the old farmers watch.
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58 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 58
58 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 58
58 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 58 Dennis and Linda sit at their dinning room table. Trouble Comes Knocking by Timber Timbre A noise. Dennis perks up. More noises. The sound of movement. Footsteps. Clanking of metal. Rustling. It's getting louder.
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59 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 59
59 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 59
59 EXT. PRAIRIE GRASS WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - DAY 59 Music: Smoke and Mirrors by RJD2 Brice is leading two men away, both of them CHAINED together, following behind him.
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61 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 61
61 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 61
61 EXT. LARGE TREE BY STREAM WEST OF PRAIRIE CITY - AFTERNOON 61 Philip Sontag is staring down an aggressive Colonel Rex as he considers his decision from earlier. Now we SEE HIS CHOICE. Philip ACTS - he takes a swing and PUNCHES Rex square in the face. Colonel Johnson immediately TACKLES Hawkins to the
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62 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN GATE - LATE AFTERNOON 62
62 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN GATE - LATE AFTERNOON 62
62 EXT. PRAIRIE CITY MAIN GATE - LATE AFTERNOON 62 Laura Rosen and Rick Sontag pace in the main street as the gate starts to open. An EXHAUSTED Hawkins comes through the main gate. GENERAL MARKUS (V.O.)
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63 EXT. PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 63
63 EXT. PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 63
63 EXT. PRAIRIE - AFTERNOON 63 A dozen Tribe soldiers wheel a large carriage away, the SUPPLY DELIVERY from the Republic as part of the peace talks. Colonel Mullens rides next to them on horseback. GENERAL MARKUS (V.O.)
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65 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 65
65 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 65
65 INT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 65 The General sits at the head of the table, blade in hand, staring at the captive farmers. GENERAL MARKUS No peace in our time.
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66 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 66
66 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 66
66 EXT. FARMER’S HOUSE - AFTERNOON 66 General Markus, Colonel Rex and Oliver exit the farm home. A defeated Dennis moves to the door to watch them walk back into their army. Linda stays close to Dennis. GENERAL MARKUS
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69 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT TREE - AFTERNOON 69
69 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT TREE - AFTERNOON 69
69 EXT. PASTURE BY A GIANT TREE - AFTERNOON 69 As the montage ends we return to Seamus perched on the tree branch, still speaking to his audience. SEAMUS
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Anarchy

When peace talks between a fragile prairie Republic and a militarized ‘Tribe’ explode into violence, a ragtag set of survivors—an old storyteller, two young thieves, and grieving farmers—are drawn into a dangerous hunt for a lost weapon that could tilt the balance of power.

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Unique Selling Point

A post-apocalyptic drama that explores the philosophical conflict between different societal structures (democracy, tribalism, resistance) rather than just survival, with a sophisticated villain who presents a compelling alternative to traditional 'good vs. evil' narratives. The mystery of Viktor's gun adds a MacGuffin that could shift power dynamics in interesting ways.

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Average Score: 7.2
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve the script's craft, prioritize developing a clear, emotionally resonant protagonist with a strong throughline—such as focusing on Seamus or Laura—to anchor the narrative and reduce audience confusion. Additionally, minimize reliance on expository voice-over and historical flashbacks by integrating world-building through dynamic character interactions and action, which will enhance pacing, deepen emotional stakes, and make the story more engaging and cinematic.
For Executives:
The script has solid value in its rich post-apocalyptic world-building and thematic exploration of order versus chaos, appealing to fans of shows like The Walking Dead, with potential for visual spectacle and character-driven drama in a competitive market. However, risks include underdeveloped protagonists, inconsistent pacing, and heavy exposition that could alienate viewers or make the pilot feel derivative, potentially limiting its festival success or production viability unless significant revisions clarify the narrative focus and streamline the structure.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 40% Action 30% War 25% Thriller 20% Science Fiction 5%

Setting: Fall 2032, with flashbacks to Summer 2016 and various years leading up to 2026, Midwest countryside, primarily Central Illinois, including a farmer's home, Prairie City, and surrounding areas

Themes: The Enduring Human Spirit and the Drive to Rebuild, Disaster and Survival, War and Peace (Conflict and Diplomacy), Memory and Burden, Moral Ambiguity and Compromise, Power, Corruption, and Leadership, Betrayal and Deception, Loss and Grief, Hope and Redemption, The Meaning of Life and Purpose

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle between the Tribe and the Republic, with personal stakes for characters like Roy and Angus as they navigate survival, morality, and the consequences of their actions.

Mood: Somber and tense, with moments of reflection and urgency.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The narrative intertwines personal stories with broader societal collapse, creating a rich tapestry of human experience.
  • Major Twist: The betrayal during peace talks that leads to significant character deaths and escalates the conflict.
  • Distinctive Setting: The Midwest countryside serves as a stark contrast to the violent events, emphasizing the loss of normalcy.
  • Innovative Ideas: Exploration of themes like the morality of survival and the impact of trauma on human relationships.
  • Unique Characters: Complex characters like Laura Rosen challenge traditional gender roles in leadership during crises.

Comparable Scripts: The Road, Children of Men, The Walking Dead, Station Eleven, The Stand, Mad Max: Fury Road, The Handmaid's Tale, The Leftovers, The Book of Eli

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Script Level Analysis

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Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 7.50
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To improve the script from a creative standpoint, focus on deepening the complexity of antagonist characters by adding detailed backstories and motivations, which will heighten conflict and emotional engagement. Additionally, refine pacing and scene transitions to ensure a smoother narrative flow, allowing for better audience immersion and emphasis on the story's thematic depth, ultimately making the screenplay more impactful and resonant.
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Story Critique

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The script's post-apocalyptic narrative has strong thematic elements and engaging hooks, but to elevate it creatively, focus on smoothing out uneven pacing to sustain tension across sections, deepen character motivations for more relatable arcs, and refine dialogue to sound more natural and authentic, ensuring the story's philosophical depth resonates without overwhelming the action.
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Characters

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The character analysis highlights opportunities to enhance the script's depth by focusing on underdeveloped backstories and arcs, particularly for protagonists like Roy and Angus, whose impulsiveness and caution could drive more compelling conflicts. Strengthening internal motivations, relationship dynamics, and transformation triggers will create richer emotional resonance and better integrate characters with the post-apocalyptic themes, making the narrative more engaging and cohesive from a craft perspective.
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Emotional Analysis

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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

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To improve the script's craft, focus on deepening the integration of the protagonist's internal and external goals with the philosophical conflicts. Ensure that key resolutions, occurring late in the story (around 80-95%), are built up with clear emotional arcs and pivotal moments that highlight character growth, making the narrative more cohesive and impactful. This will enhance thematic depth and audience engagement by clearly linking personal struggles to broader moral dilemmas.
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Themes

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From a creative perspective, the script effectively weaves multiple themes around human resilience, but to elevate its craft, focus on tightening the narrative by reducing voice-over reliance and emphasizing character-driven moments, such as Roy and Angus's moral evolution, to deepen emotional engagement and avoid exposition-heavy sections. Enhancing the interplay between themes like memory and burden with more subtle, visual storytelling could make the post-apocalyptic world feel more immersive and personally resonant, strengthening the overall message of rebuilding.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

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The script's inconsistencies, such as character behavior shifts and abrupt story transitions, highlight opportunities for refinement in character development and narrative flow. By aligning actions with established traits, smoothing timeline jumps, and filling plot gaps with essential backstory, the writer can create a more immersive and cohesive story that better serves the post-apocalyptic themes, ultimately enhancing emotional depth and audience engagement through stronger character arcs and clearer conflict progression.
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Writer Exec

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Unique Voice

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Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the screenplay's creative craft, focus on deepening character motivations and arcs to build stronger emotional connections, refine dialogue for greater authenticity and subtext to make interactions more natural and revealing, and improve pacing by balancing action with introspection to sustain tension and engagement. By addressing these areas, the writer can leverage their evident unique voice to create a more compelling and resonant narrative.
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Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
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Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building is robust and immersive, effectively using the post-apocalyptic Midwest to drive themes and character growth, but to enhance creative craft, focus on integrating environmental details more seamlessly into dialogue and action sequences. This will deepen emotional resonance and avoid heavy reliance on voice-overs for exposition, allowing for more dynamic character interactions and a tighter narrative flow, ultimately making the story more engaging and less predictable.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script excels in character-driven storytelling and emotional depth, but reflective scenes can slow the pace, potentially diluting momentum. To enhance craft, focus on tightening these sections by weaving in more action-oriented elements while preserving introspection, and elevate early dialogue to match the stronger later scenes, ensuring a balanced narrative that maintains engagement throughout.
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Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.
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