As Seen On TV
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Logline: When a group of misfit industry professionals attempt to capitalize on a 'diversity showcase' opportunity, they become entangled in a web of corporate corruption, personal agendas, and the perils of performative wokeness in the entertainment industry. See other logline suggestoins
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USP: The Unique Selling Proposition (USP) of this script is its satirical and comedic exploration of the entertainment industry, highlighting the absurdity of the characters' actions and dialogue. With its fast-paced and witty banter, the script offers a fresh and humorous twist on familiar settings and themes. The authentic and distinctive voice of the writer adds to the originality of the scenes, making it compelling for its target audience. This script stands out from others in its genre by providing a unique and entertaining perspective on the industry and its characters.
Overview
Genres: Comedy, Drama
Setting: Contemporary, Production studio, office, elegant sitting room, bar, hotel room, Cathy's office
Overview: The screenplay earns a commendable overall score of 7.78, reflecting its strong foundation in character development, witty dialogue, and a relevant premise exploring diversity and inclusion within the entertainment industry. However, opportunities exist to enhance the clarity of the central conflict, deepen the emotional impact, and refine the satirical elements for a more profound and engaging narrative.
Themes: Professionalism and Focus, Ethics and Exploitation, Identity and Self-Expression, Comedy and Satire, Conflict and Tension, Desire for Success and Recognition, Manipulation and Deception, Personal and Professional Relationships
Conflict and Stakes: The conflicts in this story revolve around the characters' frustrations with their jobs, their personal lives, and their ambitions. The stakes include their careers, relationships, and personal fulfillment.
Overall Mood: Comedic and satirical
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: The scene has a comedic and satirical tone, highlighting the frustrations and lack of professionalism in the production studio.
Standout Features:
- Satirical take on the entertainment industry: The screenplay offers a unique and comedic perspective on the inner workings of the entertainment industry, which can attract audiences interested in behind-the-scenes stories.
- Exploration of personal and professional struggles : The screenplay delves into the challenges and frustrations faced by the characters in their careers and personal lives, providing relatable and compelling storytelling.
- Diverse cast : The inclusion of diverse characters adds depth and representation to the story, making it more appealing to a wide audience.
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$5-10 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-49, fans of satirical comedies and workplace dramas
Marketability: The screenplay offers a satirical and comedic take on the entertainment industry, which has broad appeal. The diverse cast and exploration of relevant themes make it marketable to a wide audience.
The unique blend of genres and the exploration of personal and professional struggles make it appealing to fans of workplace dramas and character-driven stories.
The comedic tone, relatable characters, and satirical take on the entertainment industry make it marketable to fans of comedies and those interested in behind-the-scenes stories.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, as the screenplay has the potential to attract a wide adult audience and generate positive word-of-mouth. It could also receive critical acclaim and awards recognition.
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
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Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and witty dialogue, sarcastic humor, and a blend of comedy and tension. The narrative description is straightforward and focuses on the actions and reactions of the characters. The writer's voice adds depth to the characters' interactions and enhances the overall entertainment value of the screenplay.
Best representation: Scene 1 - A Conversation and a Request. This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's ability to create witty and humorous dialogue, as well as their talent for crafting fast-paced and engaging scenes. It encapsulates the writer's unique voice in terms of dialogue, narrative, and direction.
Memorable Lines:
- SHIRA: Welcome to the shit show. (Scene 6)
- Cathy: No homo! Get those homos out, it is time for the Non-bis. (Scene 7)
- CATHY: I smell a comeback. (Scene 10)
- MORT: Why are you fucking me? (Scene 4)
- JASON: JASON. My name is Jason. (Scene 9)
Writing Style:
The writing style of the screenplay is characterized by fast-paced and witty dialogue, often featuring a blend of humor and social commentary. The scenes frequently explore power dynamics and manipulation through dialogue, while also addressing important social issues through satire and humor.
Style Similarities:
- Tina Fey
- Aaron Sorkin
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Engine: Claude
Screenplay Rating:
Consider
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'As Seen On TV' presents a satirical and insightful look at the entertainment industry, particularly its attempts to navigate diversity and inclusion. The creative use of the infomercial format, strong character introductions, and sharp dialogue are highlights of the script. However, the narrative would benefit from a more cohesive through-line and deeper exploration of the main characters' motivations and personal stakes. Overall, the screenplay shows promise and could be developed further to create a compelling and engaging television pilot.
Strengths
- The use of the infomercial format in the 'Hag No More' product introduction provides an engaging and humorous entry point into the story. This creative approach to establishing the central conflict and characters sets an intriguing tone. medium ( Scene 4 (INT. GRAPHICS) )
- Carmella's confident and over-the-top performance in the infomercial segment effectively introduces the character and her motivations. The writing captures her larger-than-life persona and comedic delivery. high ( Scene 7 (INT. ELEGANT SITTING ROOM) )
- The portrayal of Cathy Newlan's character as a clueless, out-of-touch executive trying to navigate diversity and inclusion topics lands as a sharp satire of the entertainment industry's performative wokeness. The comedic timing and cringe-worthy dialogue in this scene are effective. high ( Scene 20 (INT. CATHY'S OFFICE. DAY) )
Areas of Improvement
- The story would benefit from a more cohesive through-line connecting the various storylines and characters. The transitions between the different subplot threads feel abrupt and disjointed at times. medium ( Scene 3 (INT. PRODUCTION STUDIO. DAY) )
- The diversity showcase setup feels slightly forced and could be integrated more organically into the overall narrative. The character motivations and reactions to this opportunity could be explored in greater depth. medium ( Scene 18 (INT. OFFICE WAITING AREA. DAY) )
MissingElements
- More backstory and context for the main characters, particularly Daniel and Shira, would help ground the viewer and make their relationship and dynamics more compelling. medium ( Scene 1 (INTERIOR PRODUCTION STUDIO BATHROOM DAY) )
- Freddy's personal stakes and motivations beyond the diversity showcase opportunity are not fully explored. Developing his character arc and internal journey would strengthen the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 16 (INT. KAYLA AND FREDDY'S HOUSE) )
NotablePoints
- The dialogue between the characters, particularly Daniel and Shira, is sharp, witty, and effectively captures the cynicism and self-awareness of the industry insiders. The banter and social commentary provide engaging moments throughout the screenplay. high ( Scene 12 (INT. PRODUCTION STUDIO. DAY) Scene 25 (INT. BAR. NIGHT) )
- The unsettling power dynamics and coercive nature of the relationship between Kayla and Mort add an intriguing layer of complexity to the story, hinting at darker undercurrents within the entertainment industry. medium ( Scene 24 (INT. HOTEL ROOM. NIGHT) )
Engine: Gemini
Screenplay Rating:
Consider
Executive Summary
As Seen On TV is a TV pilot with potential, offering a satirical look at the entertainment industry with its quirky characters and humorous situations. However, it needs improvement in pacing, character development, and sensitivity in handling certain topics. With further refinement, it could become a compelling and thought-provoking series.
Strengths
- The screenplay opens with a strong and humorous scene that immediately establishes the tone and introduces the main characters. Freddy and Shira's dialogue is witty and engaging, showcasing their dynamic and personalities. The conflict between Shira and Freddy is established early on, hinting at their complex relationship. high ( Scene 1 (1) Scene 2 (9) )
- Shira, Daniel, and Freddy have distinct personalities and quirks that make them memorable and entertaining. Their interactions are often humorous and contribute to the overall comedic tone of the screenplay. Shira's ambition, Daniel's cynicism, and Freddy's naivety create a dynamic ensemble. high ( Scene 3 (12) Scene 6 (18) Scene 9 (25) )
- The screenplay effectively satirizes the entertainment industry, particularly reality TV and the pursuit of fame. It highlights the superficiality and absurdity of the industry through exaggerated characters and situations. Kayla's interactions with Mort and her ambitions for reality TV stardom provide both humor and social commentary. medium ( Scene 4 (13) Scene 8 (24) )
Areas of Improvement
- The overall pacing of the screenplay could be improved. While the individual scenes are engaging, the transitions between them could be smoother, and the overall narrative could be tightened to maintain momentum. high
- Cathy Newlan's portrayal relies heavily on stereotypes and offensive humor related to gender identity and diversity. While the intention may be satirical, the execution could be perceived as insensitive and could benefit from a more nuanced approach. high ( Scene 7 (20) )
- While the main characters are introduced effectively, their backstories and motivations could be further explored to create a stronger emotional connection with the audience. medium ( Scene 1 (1) Scene 3 (12) )
- The ending of the pilot episode feels abrupt and leaves several plot threads unresolved. It would benefit from a clearer sense of closure or a cliffhanger that sets up the next episode. medium
MissingElements
- The screenplay could benefit from exploring the emotional consequences of the characters' actions and the challenges they face in navigating the entertainment industry. This would add depth and complexity to the narrative. medium
- While the screenplay satirizes the industry, it could also explore the positive aspects of representation and diversity in media. This would provide a more balanced perspective. medium
NotablePoints
- The scene in the waiting room, where Shira and Daniel pretend to be of different ethnicities, is a clever commentary on identity politics and the pressure to conform to certain stereotypes. high ( Scene 6 (18) )
- Kayla's character is particularly interesting, as she embodies both the absurdity and the cunningness of individuals seeking fame in the reality TV world. Her manipulation of Mort adds an unexpected layer to the story. medium ( Scene 5 (16) Scene 8 (24) )
Screenplay Insights:
Characters: 8.25, The screenplay demonstrates effective character development, creating engaging and relatable characters that drive the narrative forward. While the complexity and growth of certain characters stand out, there are opportunities to refine and enhance character development in specific areas to deepen the audience's connection and emotional investment. See More
Premise: 7.75, The screenplay's premise, centering on the satirical exploration of diversity and inclusion within the entertainment industry, exhibits strong potential with its comedic tone and unique character dynamics. However, the premise's clarity and overall direction could benefit from further refinement to ensure a more engaging narrative and sustained audience interest. See More
Structure: 7.5, The screenplay exhibits a cohesive narrative structure and effectively develops its plot to maintain audience engagement. However, certain areas could be refined to enhance the screenplay's storytelling dynamics and overall impact. See More
Theme: 7.75, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes and messages, prioritizing the exploration of industry ethics and the representation of marginalized groups. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the clarity and emotional depth of the messages, especially regarding the personal experiences of the characters. See More
Visual Impact: 7.75, The screenplay demonstrates a creative and satirical approach to visual imagery, with a focus on capturing the absurdities of the entertainment industry. The vivid descriptions and use of visual elements, such as the squirt bottle and the diversity showcase, enhance the comedic tone and satirical themes. However, some scenes lack visual depth and could benefit from more imaginative and distinctive imagery. See More
Emotional Impact: 6.75, The screenplay demonstrates potential for emotional engagement through its satirical humor and character-driven conflicts. However, it currently lacks depth in exploring the emotional complexities of its characters and themes. Further development of emotional arcs, particularly for Shira and Daniel, and a more nuanced exploration of the satirical elements would significantly enhance the overall emotional impact. See More
Conflict: 7.25, The screenplay's conflict and stakes are well-crafted, effectively driving narrative tension and audience engagement through the characters' motivations and goals. However, there are opportunities to enhance the clarity and significance of the central conflict, as well as its escalation throughout the story. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay showcases originality and creativity in its exploration of societal issues, particularly through the character of Shira's journey as a marginalized group. It effectively satirizes the entertainment industry and prompts reflection on the exploitation of marginalized communities. See More
Premise: 7.75, The screenplay's premise, centering on the satirical exploration of diversity and inclusion within the entertainment industry, exhibits strong potential with its comedic tone and unique character dynamics. However, the premise's clarity and overall direction could benefit from further refinement to ensure a more engaging narrative and sustained audience interest. See More
Structure: 7.5, The screenplay exhibits a cohesive narrative structure and effectively develops its plot to maintain audience engagement. However, certain areas could be refined to enhance the screenplay's storytelling dynamics and overall impact. See More
Theme: 7.75, The screenplay effectively conveys its themes and messages, prioritizing the exploration of industry ethics and the representation of marginalized groups. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the clarity and emotional depth of the messages, especially regarding the personal experiences of the characters. See More
Visual Impact: 7.75, The screenplay demonstrates a creative and satirical approach to visual imagery, with a focus on capturing the absurdities of the entertainment industry. The vivid descriptions and use of visual elements, such as the squirt bottle and the diversity showcase, enhance the comedic tone and satirical themes. However, some scenes lack visual depth and could benefit from more imaginative and distinctive imagery. See More
Emotional Impact: 6.75, The screenplay demonstrates potential for emotional engagement through its satirical humor and character-driven conflicts. However, it currently lacks depth in exploring the emotional complexities of its characters and themes. Further development of emotional arcs, particularly for Shira and Daniel, and a more nuanced exploration of the satirical elements would significantly enhance the overall emotional impact. See More
Conflict: 7.25, The screenplay's conflict and stakes are well-crafted, effectively driving narrative tension and audience engagement through the characters' motivations and goals. However, there are opportunities to enhance the clarity and significance of the central conflict, as well as its escalation throughout the story. See More
Originality: 8.25, The screenplay showcases originality and creativity in its exploration of societal issues, particularly through the character of Shira's journey as a marginalized group. It effectively satirizes the entertainment industry and prompts reflection on the exploitation of marginalized communities. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- In this scene, Daniel is caught watching a video on his phone in the production studio bathroom while Shira and Freddy direct Carmella. Shira and Freddy are frustrated with Daniel's lack of focus and professionalism. A video of a neck advertising an anti-aging cream is shown, and Carmella promotes the cream in an elegant sitting room. Tension arises between Shira and Daniel, and Carmella falls asleep during filming, causing conflicts that are not resolved in this scene. The tone of the scene is comedic and satirical, with key dialogue highlighting Cathy's hostage-like statement, Shira and Freddy's frustration, and Carmella's promotion of the cream. The visual elements include the neck video and Carmella's suggestive application of the cream. The scene concludes with Carmella continuing to promote the anti-aging cream in the elegant sitting room.
- Freddy and Shira watch playback of their work and discuss it. They talk about their personal lives and Freddy's dad's involvement in the project. Shira tries to get in touch with Daniel and deals with him flirting with the craft services delivery guy. Freddy walks through the hallway and is recognized by a PA. He then enters an elegant sitting room where he talks to Carmella about the infomercial they are shooting. The scene ends with Freddy trying to convince Carmella to participate in the infomercial.
- Shira confronts Daniel and receives a sandwich from him. The PA announces the absence of a model. Daniel updates his dating profile while Shira drinks his tequila. Carmella goes on a rampage, with Freddy chasing after her. Shira shows Daniel an ad for a diversity showcase, which he decides to enter. Shira vents her frustration with her job and accidentally leaves her walkie-talkie on before running off.
- In an elegant sitting room, Freddy is organizing pillows when Mort confronts him about losing Carmella. As they argue, Shira enters and passes out on Freddy's shoulder, then proceeds to vomit on his shoes. Mort becomes even angrier and threatens to fire everyone. The tension escalates when a man in a harness arrives with gay sex props, leaving the conflict unresolved. The scene ends with Mort's threat hanging in the air, creating a chaotic and tense atmosphere.
- Kayla, dressed as a Disney princess, argues with Freddy about their financial situation and suggests unconventional ways to make money. Freddy proposes a diversity showcase as a solution. Meanwhile, Daniel confronts Shira outside her apartment about their job loss and his living situation. The conflicts between Kayla and Freddy, as well as Daniel and Shira, remain unresolved in this comedic and sarcastic scene.
- Shira and Daniel arrive at an office waiting area for their appointments with Ms. Newlan. They exchange angry glances while filling out forms. Freddy also arrives and is recognized by the receptionist. Aaron leads Freddy to Ms. Newlan's office. The tension between Shira and Daniel remains unresolved in this scene.
- Cathy, a drug-using TV executive, tries to cover up her drug use while pitching a reality show to Freddy, a non-binary person, and Aaron, her assistant. They discuss pronouns and inclusivity, with Cathy getting sprayed with a squirt bottle when she says something offensive. Despite initial confusion, Freddy agrees to the deal for the show. The scene ends with Cathy and Aaron discussing the need for more liquid for their spray bottles.
- In a hotel room, Kayla manipulates Mort into helping her become the next Carmella. Despite Mort's hesitation, Kayla accuses him of plying her with martinis and reveals her ambitious plan.
- In this tense and confrontational scene, Shira, Daniel, and Freddy discuss the ethics of exploiting marginalized groups for clout while Jason finally speaks up. Meanwhile, Aaron cleans Cathy's office as she receives a threatening voicemail from Kathy. The news reports on Evan Miller's arrest for attacking a female fan and his subsequent altercation with the police, ending with him being tazed to the floor.
- Cathy and Aaron, the only characters present in Cathy's office, discuss their plans for a comeback. Cathy suggests they can mold a fresh non-bi into something they can use and smells a comeback. The tone of the scene is hopeful and optimistic. There are no conflicts or significant visual elements. The scene ends with Cathy and Aaron discussing their plans for a comeback.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
| Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
|---|---|---|---|
| Daniel | Throughout the TV-pilot, Daniel shows a shift from being solely a comedian to exploring his talents as a gangster rapper. At the beginning, he is sarcastic and makes light of the studio’s chaos while being care-free, which leads him to take risks, like entering the diversity showcase. Half-way through the pilot, he takes a turn as he starts to show how he truly feels about the African American experience through his gangster rapping. This character arc is pivotal, and moving forward, it gives him a chance to speak out and make a difference in his community. | Although Daniel's character arc shows potential growth, it lacks depth. There needs to be more context around why he decided to rap and how it relates to his personal experiences. Furthermore, his transformation could be more gradual to increase the impact of his character arc. | To improve Daniel's character arc, we suggest adding monologues where he reflects on the struggles of being African American and how he wants to use his talents to make a difference. Additionally, showing more of his backstory and how it relates to his decision to start rapping would add depth to his character. Lastly, the shift from comedian to gangster rapper could be slower to increase the impact of the transformation. |
| Shira | Shira starts as a no-nonsense director who is focused on efficiency, but she becomes frustrated with the unethical practices of the infomercial industry and begins using humor to cope with her job. Her frustration leads her to challenge the industry and advocate for more ethical practices. She presents herself as a marginalized group to gain representation and uses cultural references to make her point. Through her journey, she becomes more passionate and socially conscious, challenging others' perspectives with her sharp tongue. | The character arc is well-established, but it could benefit from further development of the challenges that Shira faces in advocating for more ethical practices. This can make her journey more compelling and relatable to the audience. Additionally, there could be more focus on how her character development affects her relationships with other characters, such as Freddy. | To improve the character arc, there could be more scenes showing Shira facing obstacles and overcoming them in her quest for ethical practices in the industry. This can make her story more engaging and relatable. Additionally, it can provide more opportunities for character development, such as showing how her journey affects her relationships with other characters. Finally, there could be more emphasis on developing her character beyond her role in the infomercial industry. |
| Freddy | In the beginning, Freddy is an easygoing and somewhat unfocused director. However, as the script progresses, he gains confidence in his creative abilities and becomes a more ambitious and driven infomercial producer. He also begins to assert himself more in difficult situations, using his wit and humor to navigate uncomfortable circumstances. As a non-binary individual, Freddy also deals with the absurdity of the entertainment industry's obsession with inclusivity, but remains unapologetically confident in their identity. | The character arc for Freddy is somewhat predictable, as we see him gradually gain more confidence and become more assertive. While this is a valid character development, it could be more nuanced and unpredictable. Additionally, the character of Freddy could benefit from having more depth and complexity to their personality, instead of relying heavily on humor and sarcasm to define them. | To improve the character arc for Freddy, the writer could consider introducing plot twists or unexpected turns that challenge Freddy's growth throughout the script. Additionally, the writer could add more moments of vulnerability or introspection for Freddy, to add depth and complexity to their personality. This could also be achieved by exploring in more depth their identity as a non-binary individual beyond the industry's obsession with inclusivity. |
| Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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| Professionalism and Focus | The screenplay explores the theme of professionalism and focus through the frustration of Shira and Freddy with Daniel's lack of focus and professionalism. | The theme of professionalism and focus is strongly represented in the screenplay, as it drives the conflicts between the characters and sets the tone for their interactions. | ||||||||||||
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| Ethics and Exploitation | The screenplay touches on the theme of ethics and exploitation through the discussions between Shira, Daniel, and Freddy about the ethics of exploiting marginalized groups for clout. | The theme of ethics and exploitation is moderately represented in the screenplay, as it raises important questions about the moral implications of using marginalized groups for personal gain. | ||||||||||||
| Identity and Self-Expression | The screenplay explores the theme of identity and self-expression through the discussions about pronouns and inclusivity, as well as the characters' personal lives and struggles. | The theme of identity and self-expression is moderately represented in the screenplay, as it delves into the characters' personal journeys and their search for authenticity and acceptance. | ||||||||||||
| Comedy and Satire | The screenplay has a comedic and satirical tone throughout, using humor to highlight the absurdities of the entertainment industry and societal norms. | The theme of comedy and satire is moderately represented in the screenplay, as it serves as the overarching tone and style of the story, providing comedic relief and social commentary. | ||||||||||||
| Conflict and Tension | The screenplay features various conflicts and tensions between the characters, such as the tension between Shira and Daniel, the conflicts between Carmella and the directors, and the conflicts over financial situations and job loss. | The theme of conflict and tension is moderately represented in the screenplay, as it drives the narrative and creates dramatic moments between the characters. | ||||||||||||
| Desire for Success and Recognition | The screenplay explores the characters' desire for success and recognition, as seen through their discussions about career opportunities, financial struggles, and the pursuit of fame. | The theme of desire for success and recognition is moderately represented in the screenplay, as it motivates the characters' actions and shapes their relationships and conflicts. | ||||||||||||
| Manipulation and Deception | The screenplay features instances of manipulation and deception, such as Kayla manipulating Mort to help her become the next Carmella and Cathy trying to cover up her drug use while presenting herself as politically correct. | The theme of manipulation and deception is weakly represented in the screenplay, as it serves as a subplot and adds complexity to the characters' motivations and actions. | ||||||||||||
| Personal and Professional Relationships | The screenplay explores the dynamics of personal and professional relationships, such as the friendships and conflicts between Shira, Daniel, and Freddy, as well as the romantic relationship between Kayla and Freddy. | The theme of personal and professional relationships is weakly represented in the screenplay, as it provides the foundation for the character interactions and drives the conflicts and resolutions. | ||||||||||||
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
|---|---|
| internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolved throughout the script, reflecting their need for personal space, recognition, validation, security, power, and success. |
| External Goals | The protagonist's external goals evolved throughout the script, reflecting the immediate circumstances and challenges they faced in their job and personal life. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay revolves around the tension between exploitation and ethics, as well as the clash between inclusivity and understanding of different gender identities versus the protagonist's lack of knowledge and experience. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's evolving internal and external goals contribute to their development by challenging their beliefs, values, and worldview. They must confront their need for validation, recognition, security, power, and success, and navigate the conflicts and challenges that arise from these goals.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's evolving goals and conflicts contribute to the narrative structure by creating tension, driving the plot forward, and providing opportunities for character growth and development. The pursuit of these goals and the resolution of conflicts shape the trajectory of the story and the protagonist's journey.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The protagonist's evolving goals and conflicts contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of identity, power dynamics, ethics, and the pursuit of success. The conflicts and challenges they face reflect larger societal issues and raise questions about the nature of exploitation, inclusivity, and personal fulfillment.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
What's going on here? - Scenes are rated on many critreia. The goal isn't to try to maximize every number; \
It's to make you aware of what's happening in your scenes. You might have very good reasons to have character development but not advance the story, or have a scene without conflict. Obviously if your dialogue is really bad, you should probably look into that.
| Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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| Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
| 1 - Lack of Focus and Professionalism Improve | Humorous, Sarcastic | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 3 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 2 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
| 2 - A Conversation and a Request Improve | Humorous, Sarcastic, Confrontational | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 4 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 3 - Frustration and Chaos in the Production Studio Improve | Humorous, Frustrated, Sarcastic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 4 - Chaos and Confrontation Improve | Awkward, Humorous, Sarcastic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
| 5 - Financial Woes and Job Loss Improve | Humorous, Sarcastic, Confrontational | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 6 - Tense Encounter in the Office Waiting Area Improve | Embarrassment, Humor, Sarcasm | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 7 - Reality Show Pitch and Political Correctness Improve | Satirical, Whimsical, Sarcastic | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 8 - Manipulation and Ambition Improve | Sarcastic, Humorous, Confrontational | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 9 - Ethics and Threats Improve | Confrontational, Sarcastic, Humorous | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
| 10 - A Hopeful Discussion Improve | Serious, Hopeful | 8 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Witty dialogue
- Satirical tone
- Strong character dynamics
- Humorous situations
- Well-developed characters
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited emotional depth
- Minimal character development
- Limited exploration of themes
- Lack of significant plot advancement
- Minimal conflict
Suggestions
- Focus on adding more emotional depth to the characters and exploring themes in a more in-depth manner
- Increase the conflict and plot advancement to keep the story engaging
- Try to create more unique and original concepts
- Continue to develop and refine the dialogue to create a distinct and memorable voice for the characters
- Experiment with different character dynamics and relationships to keep the story fresh and engaging
World Building
- Physical environment: The world depicted in the screenplay is primarily set in a production studio, an elegant sitting room, an office waiting area, a hotel room, a bar, and various other locations like a house, a street, and an office. The physical characteristics of these environments are not explicitly described in detail, but they provide the backdrop for the characters' interactions and conflicts.
- Culture: The cultural elements present in the screenplay include the use of technology (phones, cameras, social media), the focus on creating content for profit, the challenges and frustrations of the entertainment industry, the diverse cast of characters, and the characters' conversations and debates about social issues.
- Society: The societal structure is depicted through the hierarchy and dynamics between the characters, such as the director and the talent, the PA giving instructions, the inclusivity and sensitivity towards pronouns, and the characters' attempts to fit into marginalized groups. There is also a cultural element of power dynamics and manipulation between the characters.
- Technology: The technological elements present in the screenplay include the use of phones, cameras, social media, and the mention of a dating profile and a diversity showcase. However, these technological aspects are not significant or central to the narrative.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions in various ways. The fast-paced and chaotic environment of the production studio creates tension and frustration among the characters. The focus on creating content for profit influences their motivations and decisions. The challenges and frustrations of the entertainment industry shape their attitudes and behaviors. The diverse cast of characters and their conversations about social issues contribute to their conflicts and debates. The power dynamics and manipulation within the societal structure affect their relationships and interactions.
- Narrative contribution: These world elements contribute to the narrative by providing the settings and contexts for the characters' conflicts, conversations, and actions. The production studio, elegant sitting room, office waiting area, hotel room, bar, and other locations create different atmospheres and dynamics for the scenes. The cultural elements and societal structure add depth and complexity to the characters' motivations and relationships. The use of technology reflects the modern-day setting and the characters' interactions with the world around them.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring themes such as the pursuit of success and profit in the entertainment industry, the challenges and frustrations of marginalized groups, the power dynamics and manipulation within societal structures, and the ethical considerations of exploiting marginalized groups for personal gain. These themes are reflected in the characters' experiences, actions, and conversations, adding layers of meaning and social commentary to the narrative.
| Voice Analysis | |
|---|---|
| Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by sharp and witty dialogue, sarcastic humor, and a blend of comedy and tension. The narrative description is straightforward and focuses on the actions and reactions of the characters. The writer's voice adds depth to the characters' interactions and enhances the overall entertainment value of the screenplay. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a comedic and slightly chaotic tone. It also highlights the theme of the challenges and compromises in the entertainment industry, as well as addressing important social issues through humor and satire. The writer's voice adds depth to the characters' personalities and their dynamic relationships. |
| Best Representation Scene | 1 - Lack of Focus and Professionalism |
| Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it showcases the writer's ability to create witty and humorous dialogue, as well as their talent for crafting fast-paced and engaging scenes. It encapsulates the writer's unique voice in terms of dialogue, narrative, and direction. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Tone and Emotional Impact | There is a strong correlation between the tone of the scene and its emotional impact. Scenes with a humorous or sarcastic tone tend to have a lower emotional impact, while scenes with a serious or confrontational tone tend to have a higher emotional impact. |
| Dialogue and Character Changes | Scenes with a high amount of dialogue tend to have more significant character changes. This suggests that dialogue is an effective tool for character development. |
| Conflict and High Stakes | Scenes with a high level of conflict tend to have higher stakes. This makes sense, as conflict often arises when characters have something important to lose. |
| Concept and Plot | There is a moderate correlation between the concept of the scene and its plot. Scenes with a strong concept tend to have a more cohesive and well-developed plot. |
| Overall Grade and Move Story Forward | Scenes with a higher overall grade tend to do a better job of moving the story forward. This suggests that a well-written scene is more effective at advancing the plot. |
| Characters and Emotional Impact | Scenes with well-developed characters tend to have a higher emotional impact. This suggests that readers are more invested in the story when they care about the characters. |
| Humor and Conflict | Scenes with a humorous tone tend to have lower levels of conflict. This suggests that humor can be used to diffuse tension and create a more lighthearted atmosphere. |
| Sarcasm and Confrontation | Scenes with a sarcastic tone tend to be more confrontational. This suggests that sarcasm can be used as a tool for conflict and tension. |
| Emotional Impact and Character Changes | Scenes with a high emotional impact tend to have more significant character changes. This suggests that emotional moments can be used to drive character development. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The writer demonstrates a strong command of dialogue and humor, effectively creating engaging and entertaining scenes. However, there is room for improvement in terms of character development, narrative structure, and deeper emotional arcs.
Key Improvement Areas
Character Development
While the scenes showcase the writer's ability to create witty and engaging dialogue, there is room for further exploration of character motivations and deeper emotional arcs. Developing more complex conflicts and exploring character backstories can enhance the overall depth and relatability of the characters.
Narrative Structure
Some scenes could benefit from a clearer narrative structure to ensure a smooth flow and progression of events. Strengthening the plot structure and ensuring that each scene contributes to the overall story arc can enhance the screenplay's cohesiveness.
Scene Dynamics
While the scenes effectively combine humor, fast-paced action, and character dynamics, there is room for further exploration of scene dynamics. Adding subtext to the dialogue and creating more complex conflicts can elevate the tension and engagement within the scenes.
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Book | Save the Cat! Writes a Novel by Jessica Brody | This book provides insights and exercises to improve screenwriting craft, including character development and scene structure. It can help the writer enhance their skills in creating engaging scenes and developing well-rounded characters. |
| Video | MasterClass: Aaron Sorkin Teaches Screenwriting | This video course by Aaron Sorkin offers valuable lessons and techniques for screenwriting, including dialogue and pacing. Learning from a renowned screenwriter known for his unique voice and engaging dialogue can greatly benefit the writer's craft. |
| Exercise | Write scenes with conflicting goals between charactersPractice In SceneProv | Practicing writing scenes with conflicting goals can help the writer explore different types of conflicts and interactions between characters. This exercise can enhance their ability to create dynamic and engaging scenes. |
| Exercise | Write scenes with different emotional tonesPractice In SceneProv | Practicing writing scenes with different emotional tones can help expand the writer's range and improve their ability to create engaging and diverse scenes. This exercise can enhance their skills in capturing a wide range of emotions. |
| Exercise | Write scenes with clear narrative structuresPractice In SceneProv | Practicing writing scenes with clear narrative structures can help the writer improve the flow and progression of events within their screenplay. This exercise can enhance their ability to create cohesive and well-structured scenes. |
Additional Notes:
The writer consistently demonstrates a strong command of dialogue and humor, effectively engaging the audience. With further development in character depth, narrative structure, and scene dynamics, the screenplay has the potential to become even more compelling and impactful.
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Distracted by Phone | Daniel is watching a video on his phone in the production studio bathroom | The trope of being distracted by a phone is when a character is so engrossed in their phone that they lose focus on their surroundings or responsibilities. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Social Network' when Mark Zuckerberg is constantly on his phone, neglecting his relationships and other important matters. |
| Frustrated Director | Shira and Freddy are frustrated with Daniel's lack of focus and professionalism | The trope of a frustrated director is when a character in a position of authority, such as a director, becomes frustrated with the behavior or performance of someone under their supervision. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Whiplash' when the music teacher, Terence Fletcher, becomes increasingly frustrated with the main character's lack of skill and dedication. |
| Product Placement | A video of a neck is shown advertising an anti-aging cream | Product placement is a trope where a specific brand or product is prominently featured or advertised within a movie or TV show. This is often done as a form of marketing or to generate additional revenue for the production. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Transformers' where various car brands are prominently featured throughout the film. |
| Flirting with Delivery Person | Shira tries to get in touch with Daniel and deals with him flirting with the craft services delivery guy | The trope of flirting with a delivery person is when a character engages in flirtatious behavior with someone delivering a service or product. This can be used to add humor or tension to a scene. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Friends' when Joey flirts with the pizza delivery girl. |
| Drinking Alcohol in Unusual Situation | Shira grabs Daniel's cup and drinks the tequila | The trope of drinking alcohol in an unusual situation is when a character consumes alcohol in a setting or context where it is unexpected or unconventional. This can be used to add humor or surprise to a scene. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Hangover' when the characters drink alcohol in various unconventional situations throughout the film. |
| Threat of Firing | Mort threatens to fire everyone | The trope of the threat of firing is when a character in a position of authority threatens to terminate the employment of others as a means of exerting control or discipline. This can create tension and conflict within a story. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'The Office' when Michael Scott frequently threatens to fire his employees. |
| Reality TV Pitch | Cathy and Aaron pitch a reality show | The trope of a reality TV pitch is when characters within a story propose an idea for a reality television show as a plot point or narrative device. This can be used to explore themes of fame, voyeurism, and the entertainment industry. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Shark Tank' when entrepreneurs pitch their business ideas to a panel of investors. |
| Exploiting Marginalized Groups | Shira, Daniel, and Freddy discuss the ethics of exploiting marginalized groups for clout | The trope of exploiting marginalized groups is when characters within a story engage in actions or discussions that involve taking advantage of or profiting from the experiences or identities of marginalized communities. This can be used to explore themes of privilege, social justice, and the ethics of representation. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Get Out' when the main character realizes that his girlfriend's family is exploiting black people for their own gain. |
| Cleaning in a Speedo | Aaron cleans Cathy's office in a speedo | The trope of cleaning in a speedo is when a character performs cleaning tasks while wearing revealing or provocative clothing, typically for comedic effect or to create sexual tension. This can be used to add humor or create a visually striking image. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Risky Business' when Tom Cruise's character dances in his underwear while cleaning the house. |
| Threatening Voicemail | Cathy receives a threatening voicemail from Kathy | The trope of a threatening voicemail is when a character receives a voicemail message that contains a threat or warning from another character. This can be used to create suspense or advance the plot. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Breaking Bad' when Walter White receives a voicemail from a rival drug dealer, indicating a potential conflict. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Some Loglines to consider:
| When a group of misfit industry professionals attempt to capitalize on a 'diversity showcase' opportunity, they become entangled in a web of corporate corruption, personal agendas, and the perils of performative wokeness in the entertainment industry. |
| A group of cynical, ambitious industry players try to game the system and achieve their own dreams of success, only to find themselves caught up in the contradictions and hypocrisies of the entertainment world's diversity initiatives. |
| Desperate to save their floundering careers, a ragtag team of industry professionals see an opportunity in a 'diversity showcase' but quickly discover the dark underbelly of the entertainment industry's attempts at inclusivity. |
| In a satirical take on the entertainment industry, a group of outsiders navigate the complexities of diversity and inclusion initiatives, uncovering the hypocrisy and self-serving motives behind the push for representation. |
| A group of industry misfits - including a disillusioned director, a flamboyant actor, and a social media-savvy producer - attempt to leverage a 'diversity showcase' to their advantage, only to find themselves embroiled in a cutthroat battle for power and relevance. |
| Three down-on-their-luck production assistants, fired after a disastrous infomercial shoot, find themselves navigating the cutthroat world of reality TV with a clueless non-binary influencer at the helm. |
| When a desperate network executive seeks to redeem herself with a diversity showcase, a group of misfit production assistants seize the opportunity to pitch their own outrageous reality show concept. |
| A satirical comedy that follows the misadventures of Shira, Daniel, and Freddy as they attempt to create a reality TV show that will both satisfy a demanding network executive and challenge the norms of representation in media. |
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Engine: Claude
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Explanation: The screenplay for 'As Seen On TV' presents a satirical and insightful look at the entertainment industry, particularly its attempts to navigate diversity and inclusion. The creative use of the infomercial format, strong character introductions, and sharp dialogue are highlights of the script. However, the narrative would benefit from a more cohesive through-line and deeper exploration of the main characters' motivations and personal stakes. Overall, the screenplay shows promise and could be developed further to create a compelling and engaging television pilot.
Engine: Gemini
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Explanation: As Seen On TV is a TV pilot with potential, offering a satirical look at the entertainment industry with its quirky characters and humorous situations. However, it needs improvement in pacing, character development, and sensitivity in handling certain topics. With further refinement, it could become a compelling and thought-provoking series.