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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT YEREVAN DAWN
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EXT COURTYARD CONTINUOUS
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EXT STREET MARKET MORNING
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EXT YEREVAN STAIRWELL - LATE MORNING
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EXT YEREVAN STREET AFTERNOON
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EXT WAREHOUSE YARD AFTERNOON
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INT LADA - MOVING MOMENTS LATER
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EXT POLICE ROADBLOCK CONTINUOUS
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EXT ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
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EXT ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – LATER
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INT KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
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INT POLICE HOLDING CELL – LATER THAT NIGHT
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EXT POLICE YARD – DAWN
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INT VISITATION ROOM – DAY
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY
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EXT JUVENILE YARD – DAY
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INT COURTROOM – DAY
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INT HOLDING ROOM – MOMENTS LATER
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INT KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
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EXT YEREVAN ROOFTOP – DAWN
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EXT LOS ANGELES INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT – DAY
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EXT FREEWAY – DAY
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EXT FAMILY HOUSE – DAY
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INT STRIP MALL OFFICE – DAY
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INT TRAINING ROOM – LATER
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EXT ROOFTOP – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD OFFICE – MORNING
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INT BACK OFFICE – DAY
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INT DINER – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD OFFICE – DAY
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EXT GLENDALE STREET – DAY
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INT FRAUD HUB – NEW LOCATION – NIGHT
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD HUB – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAY
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INT ROOFTOP – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAY
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAWN
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EXT GLENDALE STREET – DAY
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – MORNING
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EXT PARKING GARAGE – NIGHT
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
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EXT FREEWAY – SUNSET
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INT HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT
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INT LOCAL HARDWARE STORE – DAY
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EXT PARKING LOT – NIGHT
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INT HOUSE – NIGHT
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INT HOUSE – DAWN
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INT HOUSE – NIGHT
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EXT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
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EXT HOUSE – CONTINUOUS
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INT FBI INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
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INT HOLDING CELL – NIGHT
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INT COURTROOM – DAY
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INT FEDERAL PRISON – INTAKE – NIGHT
INT EXT INT/EXT hover for full slug
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT YEREVAN DAWN
EXT. YEREVAN - DAWN
The King of Fraud by (Joe Murkijanian) 01/28/2026 Name
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EXT COURTYARD CONTINUOUS
EXT. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS
EXT. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS A SOVIET BLOCK courtyard. Laundry lines. Kids kicking a flat ball. A man welding something illegal. Aram stops at a metal door. He knocks in a rhythm. The door opens a crack.
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EXT STREET MARKET MORNING
EXT. STREET MARKET - MORNING
EXT. STREET MARKET - MORNING A chaotic open market. Loud vendors, sharper prices. Pomegranates stacked like grenades. Aram threads through bodies like he’s been doing it his whole
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EXT YEREVAN STAIRWELL - LATE MORNING
EXT. YEREVAN STAIRWELL - LATE MORNING
EXT. YEREVAN STAIRWELL - LATE MORNING Aram climbs a stairwell that smells like boiled cabbage and old cigarettes. He passes NEIGHBORS: a WOMAN carrying water, a MAN in a tank top arguing with a wall, a TEEN smoking like he invented it.
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EXT YEREVAN STREET AFTERNOON
EXT. YEREVAN STREET - AFTERNOON
EXT. YEREVAN STREET - AFTERNOON Aram walks with a backpack, headed toward school now — late, but moving like it matters. He passes a wall covered in faded posters: missing persons, political slogans, a concert that never happened.
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EXT WAREHOUSE YARD AFTERNOON
EXT. WAREHOUSE YARD - AFTERNOON
EXT. WAREHOUSE YARD - AFTERNOON The Lada pulls in. A few MEN stand around. They don’t look like workers. They look like decisions. One man steps forward — ARTUR, 30s, sleek, new money, sharp
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INT LADA - MOVING MOMENTS LATER
INT. LADA - MOVING - MOMENTS LATER
INT. LADA - MOVING - MOMENTS LATER They drive fast. No music. No jokes. Aram watches his uncle’s hands on the wheel — steady, but tight. ARAM
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EXT POLICE ROADBLOCK CONTINUOUS
EXT. POLICE ROADBLOCK - CONTINUOUS
EXT. POLICE ROADBLOCK - CONTINUOUS A uniformed OFFICER steps into the lane, raises a hand. Vartan slows. Aram stares at the officer, then at his uncle. Vartan gives a small, almost imperceptible nod — to himself.
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EXT ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS Vartan stands with the officer. Another OFFICER approaches, whispering something. The first officer nods. OFFICER
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EXT ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. ROADBLOCK – CONTINUOUS The officer crouches to Aram’s level. OFFICER You were at the warehouse today? Aram glances at Vartan. Vartan gives a tiny shake of his
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – LATER
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – LATER
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – LATER Small room. One table. Two chairs. A flickering fluorescent light. Aram sits alone. The door opens.
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INT KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT Mariam paces like a caged animal. Garegin sits at the table, hands folded, staring at nothing. The phone rings. Mariam snatches it.
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT Aram sits alone again. The light flickers. The door opens. Artur steps in.
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT The fluorescent light BUZZES. Flickers. Settles. Aram sits alone, staring at the metal table like it might give advice. The door opens.
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INT POLICE HOLDING CELL – LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. POLICE HOLDING CELL – LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. POLICE HOLDING CELL – LATER THAT NIGHT A small cell. Concrete bench. One dim bulb. Aram sits, hugging his knees. A TEENAGE BOY, 15, bruised knuckles, sits across from him. TEEN
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EXT POLICE YARD – DAWN
EXT. POLICE YARD – DAWN
EXT. POLICE YARD – DAWN Cold morning. Pale light. Aram is escorted toward a transport van. Vartan stands nearby, hands in his coat pockets, face unreadable.
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INT VISITATION ROOM – DAY
INT. VISITATION ROOM – DAY
INT. VISITATION ROOM – DAY Glass divider. Mariam sits on one side. Aram on the other. They pick up phones. MARIAM
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INT INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY
INT. INTERROGATION ROOM – DAY Aram sits again at the table. Captain Hakobyan enters, tired. CAPTAIN HAKOBYAN The witness signed a statement.
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EXT JUVENILE YARD – DAY
EXT. JUVENILE YARD – DAY
EXT. JUVENILE YARD – DAY A gray afternoon. Cold wind. Aram sits alone on a bench, reading a battered schoolbook he doesn’t need. The BIG BOY from before approaches again — HOVIK, 16. He’s
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INT COURTROOM – DAY
INT. COURTROOM – DAY
INT. COURTROOM – DAY Small. Cracked wood. Soviet-era seal hanging crooked. Aram sits between a PUBLIC DEFENDER and his parents. Mariam grips a rosary so hard it bites into her palm.
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INT HOLDING ROOM – MOMENTS LATER
INT. HOLDING ROOM – MOMENTS LATER
INT. HOLDING ROOM – MOMENTS LATER Mariam clutches Aram, whispering prayers. Garegin stands nearby, hollow. Vartan approaches.
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INT KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT
INT. KAZANJIAN APARTMENT – NIGHT Suitcases on the bed. Mariam folds clothes mechanically. Tears drip onto fabric. Garegin stands in the doorway, broken. Aram watches it all.
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EXT YEREVAN ROOFTOP – DAWN
EXT. YEREVAN ROOFTOP – DAWN
EXT. YEREVAN ROOFTOP – DAWN Aram stands alone, overlooking the city. Smoke rises. Bells ring. Life goes on without permission. Mount Ararat glows faintly in the distance. Mariam steps beside him. Wraps a coat around his shoulders.
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EXT LOS ANGELES INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT – DAY
EXT. LOS ANGELES INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT – DAY
EXT. LOS ANGELES INTERNATIONAL AIRPORT – DAY Blinding sun. Endless concrete. Planes roar like metal beasts. Aram, now 25, steps out of the terminal. Same eyes. Sharper. Quieter. A man who learned patience the
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EXT FREEWAY – DAY
EXT. FREEWAY – DAY
EXT. FREEWAY – DAY Aram rides shotgun in Levon’s car. Los Angeles stretches endlessly. Concrete rivers. Endless lanes. ARAM
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EXT FAMILY HOUSE – DAY
EXT. FAMILY HOUSE – DAY
EXT. FAMILY HOUSE – DAY A modest house. Too many cars outside. The door FLIES open before they knock. More relatives. AUNT #3
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INT STRIP MALL OFFICE – DAY
INT. STRIP MALL OFFICE – DAY
INT. STRIP MALL OFFICE – DAY A nondescript office. Fake plants. Cheap art. Inside — FRAUD. Rows of young men and women on computers. Phones. Scripts taped to desks.
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INT TRAINING ROOM – LATER
INT. TRAINING ROOM – LATER
INT. TRAINING ROOM – LATER Aram rewrites a script. Cleaner. Polite. Professional. ARAM You’re not stealing. You’re helping
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EXT ROOFTOP – NIGHT
EXT. ROOFTOP – NIGHT
EXT. ROOFTOP – NIGHT Aram stands alone, overlooking the city. The lights feel endless. Levon joins him. LEVON
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INT FRAUD OFFICE – MORNING
INT. FRAUD OFFICE – MORNING
INT. FRAUD OFFICE – MORNING The room hums louder now. Confidence has entered the building. Aram stands behind a CALLER, listening. He gestures calmly. ARAM
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INT BACK OFFICE – DAY
INT. BACK OFFICE – DAY
INT. BACK OFFICE – DAY Aram and Levon sit at a small table. LEVON We can scale this. ARAM
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INT DINER – NIGHT
INT. DINER – NIGHT
INT. DINER – NIGHT Late-night Armenian diner. Neon flickers. Aram sits across from ANI, 20s. Smart. Warm. Eyes that question things. ANI
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INT FRAUD OFFICE – DAY
INT. FRAUD OFFICE – DAY
INT. FRAUD OFFICE – DAY New desks. New faces. Aram addresses a small group. ARAM Rule one: You don’t rush Americans.
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EXT GLENDALE STREET – DAY
EXT. GLENDALE STREET – DAY
EXT. GLENDALE STREET – DAY Aram walks with Ani. ANI My mother asks about you. ARAM
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INT FRAUD HUB – NEW LOCATION – NIGHT
INT. FRAUD HUB – NEW LOCATION – NIGHT
INT. FRAUD HUB – NEW LOCATION – NIGHT Not a strip mall anymore. A clean, anonymous OFFICE FLOOR downtown. Badge access. Frosted glass. Quiet money.
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT Upscale Armenian restaurant. Warm lighting. Aram and Ani sit across from each other. ANI
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INT FRAUD HUB – NIGHT
INT. FRAUD HUB – NIGHT
INT. FRAUD HUB – NIGHT Emergency meeting. Levon. Aram. Core operators. OPERATOR One of the Texas runners got picked
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAY
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAY
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAY Aram watches a live map. Texas goes dark. LEVON You feel that?
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INT ROOFTOP – NIGHT
INT. ROOFTOP – NIGHT
INT. ROOFTOP – NIGHT Aram stands alone again. City below. Endless. Phone BUZZES. A message from an unknown number.
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAY
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAY
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAY Aram gathers the core team. ARAM Miami is compromised. Murmurs.
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT Aram eats alone. Ani’s empty chair across from him feels louder than a crowd. A WAITRESS approaches. WAITRESS
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT Ruiz reviews footage from the parking garage. A grainy shot of Aram and Artur talking. ANALYST Facial recognition’s inconclusive.
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INT FRAUD HUB – DAWN
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAWN
INT. FRAUD HUB – DAWN Aram gathers the core team again. ARAM We’re restructuring. OPERATOR
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EXT GLENDALE STREET – DAY
EXT. GLENDALE STREET – DAY
EXT. GLENDALE STREET – DAY Aram walks past an Armenian church. He stops. Looks at it. For the first time in years… he goes inside.
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – MORNING
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – MORNING
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – MORNING Agent Ruiz stares at a dead board. Photos coming down. Red strings cut. ANALYST Everything went quiet.
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EXT PARKING GARAGE – NIGHT
EXT. PARKING GARAGE – NIGHT
EXT. PARKING GARAGE – NIGHT Artur waits again. Same place. Same smile. Aram approaches—unafraid. ARTUR You went quiet.
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INT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
INT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT Ruiz watches live feeds. Parking garage cameras. ANALYST That’s him. Ruiz leans in.
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EXT FREEWAY – SUNSET
EXT. FREEWAY – SUNSET
EXT. FREEWAY – SUNSET Aram drives. Ani beside him. The city recedes. ANI Where are we going? ARAM
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INT HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – KITCHEN – NIGHT They eat in silence. Normal sounds feel foreign to him — forks, chewing, the hum of a fridge. ANI
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INT LOCAL HARDWARE STORE – DAY
INT. LOCAL HARDWARE STORE – DAY
INT. LOCAL HARDWARE STORE – DAY Aram browses tools. A CLERK chats him up. CLERK You new around here?
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EXT PARKING LOT – NIGHT
EXT. PARKING LOT – NIGHT
EXT. PARKING LOT – NIGHT Levon sits in his car, engine off. Phone in hand. LEVON
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INT HOUSE – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT Aram wakes suddenly. Not from a sound. From absence. He sits up.
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INT HOUSE – DAWN
INT. HOUSE – DAWN
INT. HOUSE – DAWN Aram sits at the kitchen table. Laptop open. Not connected to anything. Just notes.
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INT HOUSE – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT Aram sits at the kitchen table. Laptop open again. This time it’s live. He’s not building an empire.
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EXT FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
EXT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT
EXT. FBI FIELD OFFICE – NIGHT Ruiz watches a live data stream spike. ANALYST Something’s lighting up. AGENT RUIZ
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EXT HOUSE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HOUSE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. HOUSE – CONTINUOUS FBI VEHICLES line the street. Not dramatic. Surgical. AGENT RUIZ stands at the door when Aram opens it. AGENT RUIZ
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INT FBI INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. FBI INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT
INT. FBI INTERROGATION ROOM – NIGHT Glass walls. Cameras. Red light on. Aram sits. Ruiz slides a thick folder across the table. AGENT RUIZ
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INT HOLDING CELL – NIGHT
INT. HOLDING CELL – NIGHT
INT. HOLDING CELL – NIGHT Aram alone again. Concrete. Steel. The same smell as Yerevan. History repeats — but differently.
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INT COURTROOM – DAY
INT. COURTROOM – DAY
INT. COURTROOM – DAY Packed. Media frenzy. Aram in cuffs again — composed, immaculate. Charges read.
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INT FEDERAL PRISON – INTAKE – NIGHT
INT. FEDERAL PRISON – INTAKE – NIGHT
INT. FEDERAL PRISON – INTAKE – NIGHT A long concrete corridor. Fluorescent lights buzz overhead — same sound as Yerevan. Same smell. Different country. Aram walks in cuffs, escorted by GUARDS.
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The King of Fraud

When a twelve-year-old delivery boy in Yerevan is framed for murder, he flees to America and, years later, becomes the quiet architect of a global fraud ring — forcing him to choose between the survival rules he learned as a child and the human cost of the empire he built. Other loglines ›

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The script's unique selling proposition lies in its nuanced exploration of the protagonist's moral journey, blending elements of crime, family, and personal growth. The script's focus on the systemic nature of fraud and the protagonist's role as both a perpetrator and a victim creates a compelling narrative that challenges the audience's preconceptions. Additionally, the script's use of Armenian culture and setting provides a fresh and distinctive backdrop that sets it apart from more generic crime stories.

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OpenAI
 Recommend
Score 8.0
Grok
 Recommend
Score 8.3
Gemini
 Consider
Score 8.0
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Score 8.3
Claude
 Recommend
Score 8.5
Average Score: 8.2
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate 'The King of Fraud,' focus on deepening secondary characters like Vartan and Ani by adding specific backstories and motivations, ensuring their relationships with Aram drive emotional stakes and thematic resonance. Tighten pacing in transitional sequences, such as the move to America, by incorporating more catalytic scenes that show rather than tell Aram's growth. Additionally, integrate victim perspectives and clearer moral consequences to add layers of complexity, making the narrative more immersive and ethically nuanced while preserving the script's strong cultural voice and thematic cohesion.
For Executives:
This script offers strong value as a culturally specific, character-driven crime drama with commercial potential, appealing to audiences of films like 'The Wolf of Wall Street' or 'Eastern Promises' through its fresh take on fraud and immigrant experience. However, risks include uneven pacing that could disengage viewers in the middle act and underdeveloped secondary characters that weaken emotional depth, potentially limiting broad appeal. Market perception may see it as a solid indie project with room for revision to achieve mainstream success, but ambiguity in the ending and lack of victim focus could frustrate audiences seeking clear catharsis, making it a moderate investment with targeted polishing needed for profitability.
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Story Facts
Genres:
Crime 55% Drama 45% Thriller 35% Romance 15% Comedy 10%

Setting: Contemporary, Yerevan, Armenia, and Los Angeles, California

Themes: The Corrupting Nature of Power and Survival, Loss of Innocence and Identity, The Nature of Systems and Structures, Family, Loyalty, and Sacrifice, The Search for Belonging and Connection

Conflict & Stakes: Aram's struggle to navigate the criminal underworld while protecting his family and maintaining his identity, with the stakes involving his freedom and safety.

Mood: Tense and introspective, with moments of hope and resilience.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The protagonist's journey from a carefree childhood in Armenia to navigating the complexities of crime in America.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Aram's strategic thinking and ability to manipulate situations to his advantage, culminating in his acceptance in prison.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrasting environments of Yerevan and Los Angeles, showcasing cultural differences and the immigrant experience.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of crime as a means of survival and the moral complexities involved in Aram's choices.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast that includes strong female characters and complex male figures, each with their own motivations and backgrounds.

Comparable Scripts: The Kite Runner, City of God, The Godfather, Breaking Bad, A Clockwork Orange, The Wire, Goodfellas, The Shawshank Redemption, The Outsiders

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.84
Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's craft, prioritize deepening the backstories and motivations of supporting characters like Levon and Artur to add layers of complexity and emotional weight. Additionally, refine pacing by tightening drawn-out scenes and clarifying character motivations, while incorporating more introspective moments to heighten emotional depth and visual dynamism, ensuring a more immersive and engaging narrative that resonates with audiences on a deeper level.
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Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script 'The King of Fraud' has strong character development and thematic depth, but to elevate it creatively, focus on refining pacing to ensure a smoother narrative flow, particularly in the middle sections where the story can drag. Enhancing backstories for secondary characters like Artur and Vartan will add emotional layers and make their motivations more compelling, while incorporating stronger foreshadowing and direct conflicts will create a tighter, more engaging arc that balances tension and resolution.
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Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights opportunities to strengthen the script by deepening emotional layers and character arcs, particularly for supporting roles like Ani and Levon, who show less transformation. Focus on exploring backstories, internal conflicts, and relational dynamics to create more nuanced portrayals, enhancing audience empathy and narrative tension, while ensuring Aram's strong arc remains the centerpiece for a cohesive story.
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Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional arc is compelling in the first half but suffers from monotony and fatigue in the latter sections, with insufficient variety and relief from dominant negative emotions. To enhance craft, focus on integrating moments of joy, surprise, and cultural connection, balancing intensity to avoid audience desensitization, and deepening character empathy and moral complexity for a more nuanced, engaging narrative that sustains emotional investment throughout.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The goals_pc analysis highlights Aram's strong character arc driven by internal and external conflicts, particularly the philosophical struggle between survival and integrity. To improve the script creatively, focus on tightening the pacing in the middle acts to heighten tension and ensure that key philosophical moments are more subtly woven into dialogue and actions, allowing for deeper emotional resonance and avoiding exposition-heavy scenes that could dilute the impact of Aram's evolution.
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Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strong thematic foundation on the corrupting influence of power and survival can be enhanced by deepening Aram's internal conflicts and ensuring his transformation feels organic and layered. Focus on refining the cyclical narrative to avoid predictability, perhaps by adding more nuanced interactions with secondary characters like Ani or family members to heighten emotional stakes and provide contrast to the impersonal systems he navigates. This will make the story more resonant and help avoid common tropes in crime dramas, ultimately strengthening character arcs and thematic depth.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's narrative craft, prioritize resolving major inconsistencies like Uncle Vartan's contradictory status, which disrupts character arcs and plot logic, making the story feel erratic. Focus on filling logical gaps, such as Aram's escape to the U.S., and reduce redundancies in repetitive scenes, like rooftop reflections, to enhance pacing and authenticity, ensuring characters and events evolve naturally for a more immersive and cohesive tale.
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Scene Analysis

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Writer Exec

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Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice excels in building tension through subtle dialogue and atmosphere, but to elevate it creatively, focus on deepening character emotional arcs and ensuring that the subtext doesn't overshadow key plot developments. By expanding on moments of vulnerability, such as Aram's internal conflicts, and varying the pacing to include more reflective scenes, the writer can enhance audience engagement and make the moral ambiguities more resonant, turning a strong foundation into a compelling, emotionally layered narrative.
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Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's strengths lie in its tense pacing and thematic depth, but to enhance its creative impact, focus on adding subtext to dialogue for richer emotional layers, deepening character backstories to build complexity and relatability, and tightening overall pacing to sustain engagement and avoid drag in key scenes. These refinements will make the narrative more compelling and immersive, elevating the story's emotional resonance and audience connection.
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Memorable Lines
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Tropes
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building is a strong asset, effectively using contrasting environments like Yerevan's gritty urban decay and LA's modern sprawl to mirror Aram's character arc and thematic depth. To elevate the craft, focus on integrating world elements more dynamically into key scenes—such as making cultural rituals or technological tools more interactive in driving plot points—ensuring they enhance emotional stakes and avoid feeling expository, which could deepen immersion and character relatability for a more compelling narrative flow.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in emotional and philosophical scenes that drive deep character development and impactful dialogue, showcasing your strength in introspective storytelling. To enhance the overall craft, focus on integrating more conflict and plot progression into reflective and humorous moments to prevent pacing stalls and maintain consistent engagement, ensuring that character growth accelerates earlier and tension remains dynamic throughout.
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