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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT WAR-TORN CITY NIGHT
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EXT IMPACT ZONE CONTINUOUS
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EXT CHECKPOINT ZERO – NIGHT
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EXT PERIMETER WALL – CONTINUOUS
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INT ADMIN TENT – NIGHT
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EXT CHECKPOINT ZERO – COURTYARD – PRE DAWN
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EXT CONVOY STAGING AREA – DAWN
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EXT ROAD OUT OF THE CITY – MORNING
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EXT OVERTURNED TROOP TRUCK – CONTINUOUS
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EXT BASE ECHO – EVENING
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EXT BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – NIGHT
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EXT RUINED HIGHWAY – NIGHT
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EXT APPROACH TO THE GREY ZONE – NIGHT
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INT COLLAPSED INTERIOR – NIGHT
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EXT GREY ZONE – MAKESHIFT TRIAGE – DAWN
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EXT BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
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EXT GREY ZONE – TRIAGE AREA – LATER (DAY)
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EXT BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – DAY
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – MOMENTS LATER
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – EDGE OF THE SQUARE – SUNSET
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INT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – NIGHT
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
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INT BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATE NIGHT
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE DAWN
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS AFTER BLACK
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EXT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – DAWN
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE DAWN
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EXT ENEMY ARTILLERY RIDGE – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE – FIRST IMPACTS
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EXT TRIAGE – LULL
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER
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EXT TRIAGE – EDGE OF SQUARE – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE – QUIETER CORNER – TWILIGHT
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
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EXT RUINED STREETS – APPROACH TO SQUARE – NIGHT
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EXT SQUARE’S NORTH ALLEY – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER THAT NIGHT
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EXT NORTH ALLEY / MAKESHIFT HOLDING POINT – NIGHT
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EXT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – LATER THAT NIGHT
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – WEE HOURS
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EXT TRIAGE – ANOTHER CORNER – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – MOMENTS LATER
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EXT TRIAGE – QUIET SIDE – MOMENTS LATER
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EXT LARA’S CORNER – SAME TIME
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – JUST BEFORE DAWN
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – SAME TIME
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
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EXT RUINED BUILDING OVERLOOKING ROAD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – MOMENTS LATER
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – DAY (LATER)
INT EXT INT/EXT hover for full slug
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT WAR-TORN CITY NIGHT
EXT. WAR-TORN CITY - NIGHT (AERIAL)
EXT. WAR-TORN CITY - NIGHT (AERIAL) SILENCE. A drone’s eye view drifting over a metropolis that has been chewed down to the bone. The skyline is a jagged EKG of broken concrete. Entire city
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EXT IMPACT ZONE CONTINUOUS
EXT. IMPACT ZONE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. IMPACT ZONE - CONTINUOUS Lara runs into the fog of dust. It’s chaos. Civilians—mostly families who refused to leave—are digging frantically into a pile of rubble. A WOMAN screams in a dialect Lara barely understands,
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EXT CHECKPOINT ZERO – NIGHT
EXT. CHECKPOINT ZERO – NIGHT
EXT. CHECKPOINT ZERO – NIGHT Lara sits on a crate while Farid examines her. She looks drained, older somehow. Her skin has a faint pallor. FARID Your pulse is fast. Pupils
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EXT PERIMETER WALL – CONTINUOUS
EXT. PERIMETER WALL – CONTINUOUS
EXT. PERIMETER WALL – CONTINUOUS A FAMILY OF THREE is caught in open ground — they ran the wrong direction. Bullets tear the pavement around them. Lara breaks into a sprint. FARID
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INT ADMIN TENT – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN TENT – NIGHT
INT. ADMIN TENT – NIGHT A single laptop flickers on a folding table. Maps, casualty reports, and coffee cups clutter the surface. LARA stands in front of the screen, still bandaged, eyes hot with anger.
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EXT CHECKPOINT ZERO – COURTYARD – PRE DAWN
EXT. CHECKPOINT ZERO – COURTYARD – PRE-DAWN
EXT. CHECKPOINT ZERO – COURTYARD – PRE-DAWN Dark blue hour. The sky is bruised but not yet lit. SOLDIERS move like ghosts, loading crates into trucks. ENGINES idle. Exhaust mingles with the cold air. Lara moves through the chaos, her limp more pronounced. Farid
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EXT CONVOY STAGING AREA – DAWN
EXT. CONVOY STAGING AREA – DAWN
EXT. CONVOY STAGING AREA – DAWN The horizon glows a dirty orange. A line of armored trucks, troop carriers, and two battered ambulances stretch across the road. KELLER barks orders.
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EXT ROAD OUT OF THE CITY – MORNING
EXT. ROAD OUT OF THE CITY – MORNING
EXT. ROAD OUT OF THE CITY – MORNING The convoy moves through a corridor of ruins. Burned-out cars. Collapsed facades. The occasional corpse that no one had time to collect. INSIDE AMBULANCE ONE – moving.
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EXT OVERTURNED TROOP TRUCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. OVERTURNED TROOP TRUCK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. OVERTURNED TROOP TRUCK – CONTINUOUS Lara dives under the side of the truck, crawling up into the overturned interior. Men groan, disoriented. One tries to raise his weapon. LARA
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EXT BASE ECHO – EVENING
EXT. BASE ECHO – EVENING
EXT. BASE ECHO – EVENING A fortified compound carved out of an old industrial complex. High blast walls, guard towers, razor wire. The convoy limps through the gates as they close behind them.
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EXT BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – NIGHT
EXT. BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – NIGHT
EXT. BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – NIGHT Floodlights hum over silent rows of armored vehicles. Most are locked down, tagged for inspection. A LONE HUMVEE sits unattended, engine cold but keys dangling from the dash — someone got lazy during offload.
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EXT RUINED HIGHWAY – NIGHT
EXT. RUINED HIGHWAY – NIGHT
EXT. RUINED HIGHWAY – NIGHT The Humvee crawls through the darkness, headlights off. Moonlight glints off broken concrete and twisted metal. The city looms ahead — glowing intermittently as artillery flashes illuminate its skeletal remains.
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EXT APPROACH TO THE GREY ZONE – NIGHT
EXT. APPROACH TO THE GREY ZONE – NIGHT
EXT. APPROACH TO THE GREY ZONE – NIGHT BOOOOOOOM. A massive explosion ahead lights up the skyline. The ENTIRE HORIZON briefly becomes white fire. Lara jerks the wheel, stopping the Humvee atop a rise.
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INT COLLAPSED INTERIOR – NIGHT
INT. COLLAPSED INTERIOR – NIGHT
INT. COLLAPSED INTERIOR – NIGHT Lara climbs inside — coughing through thick dust. Half the building is missing. Steel rods hang like rib bones. Smoke curls along the ceiling. She hears faint banging. A trapped survivor.
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EXT GREY ZONE – MAKESHIFT TRIAGE – DAWN
EXT. GREY ZONE – MAKESHIFT TRIAGE – DAWN
EXT. GREY ZONE – MAKESHIFT TRIAGE – DAWN First light seeps through a choking haze of dust and smoke. A rough triage area has sprung up around the Humvee: tarps stretched over broken rebar, bloodied blankets on the ground, IV bags hanging from rusted poles.
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EXT BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
EXT. BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
EXT. BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME A large digital map glows on the table. Red and blue icons blink across the city. COL. MARLOWE studies it, tight-lipped. KELLER stands opposite, uniform dusty, forehead stitched.
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EXT GREY ZONE – TRIAGE AREA – LATER (DAY)
EXT. GREY ZONE – TRIAGE AREA – LATER (DAY)
EXT. GREY ZONE – TRIAGE AREA – LATER (DAY) The sun is an anemic glare through the smoke. The triage is busier. Word has spread. More CIVILIANS gather with makeshift stretchers, carrying wounded from surrounding blocks.
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EXT BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – DAY
EXT. BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – DAY
EXT. BASE ECHO – MOTOR POOL – DAY KELLER checks gear on a small armored patrol vehicle — lighter than an APC, heavier than a Humvee. Three SOLDIERS strap in: HARRIS (the resurrected rifleman), VEGA (30s, sniper), and
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – CONTINUOUS Lara’s posture tightens. She recognizes the silhouette of the vehicle instantly. Farid mutters:
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – MOMENTS LATER Keller paces, thinking, while Vega and Harris watch the perimeter. VEGA eyes the civilians, then Lara. VEGA
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EXT TRIAGE AREA – EDGE OF THE SQUARE – SUNSET
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – EDGE OF THE SQUARE – SUNSET
EXT. TRIAGE AREA – EDGE OF THE SQUARE – SUNSET The sky bleeds red through the smoke. For the first time all day, the guns are quiet. Lara stands at the edge of the square, looking out at the shattered streets beyond — the city still full of people she
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INT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – NIGHT
INT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – NIGHT
INT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – NIGHT A dark, reinforced room buried under sandbags and concrete. Maps pinned to boards. Old computers. A weathered radio bank. The air is thick with cigarette smoke. GENERAL RAZIM NADER (50s) stands over a table, studying
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – CONTINUOUS
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – CONTINUOUS
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – CONTINUOUS Dim. Dust motes swirl in shafted moonlight. Farid and Kareem set the stretcher down. The wounded man, QASIM (28), grits his teeth. QASIM
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT Lara stands atop a broken COLUMN, addressing a small group: Leila, Yara, Kareem (back from the shop), and a few OTHER LOCALS. A hand-drawn MAP of the immediate blocks is spread over a
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INT BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
INT. BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME
INT. BASE ECHO – COMMAND TENT – SAME TIME Marlowe stares at a fresh intel packet. A liaison officer from higher command, CAPTAIN DYKSTRA (40s), stands stiff at attention. DYKSTRA
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATE NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATE NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATE NIGHT Everything feels… on edge. Lara stands in the center of the square, looking up at the sky. The air feels thicker. Charged.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE-DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE-DAWN A restless stillness. Civilians doze lightly, boots on, bags packed. Kids nest in corners. Sentries on rooftops, including YARA and another YOUNG MAN,
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS BOOOOOOM. The blast hits at the edge of the square, hurling debris. A building façade collapses, showering stone. Lara is thrown off her feet, lands hard, ears ringing.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS AFTER BLACK
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS AFTER BLACK
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – CONTINUOUS AFTER BLACK Silence. Then— A HIGH-PITCHED RINGING bleeds in. Dust hangs in the air like snow in hell.
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EXT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – DAWN
EXT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – DAWN
EXT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – DAWN A reconnaissance DRONE FEED displays the grey zone — smoke, but not annihilation. General Nader frowns. AIDE
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME Qasim convulses. Kareem panics, yelling for Farid. Farid rushes in. FARID Okay, okay—
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE-DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – PRE-DAWN The square vibrates with distant concussions. LARA stands in the center, eyes scanning the faces gathered around: LEILA, YARA (bandaged, on crutches now), KAREEM with his baby, FARID, KELLER, HARRIS, VEGA, dozens of CIVILIANS.
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EXT ENEMY ARTILLERY RIDGE – SAME TIME
EXT. ENEMY ARTILLERY RIDGE – SAME TIME
EXT. ENEMY ARTILLERY RIDGE – SAME TIME The guns fire in a deadly rhythm. Spent shells clatter to the ground. Nader watches a tablet displaying a simplified grid overlay. Each shell’s target flashes as a pulsing dot.
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EXT TRIAGE – FIRST IMPACTS
EXT. TRIAGE – FIRST IMPACTS
EXT. TRIAGE – FIRST IMPACTS BOOOOOOM. A shell obliterates a building on the north side — exactly where one of her “versions” predicted.
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EXT TRIAGE – LULL
EXT. TRIAGE – LULL
EXT. TRIAGE – LULL Abrupt silence. No more whistling shells. Just ringing ears, groans, crackle of fire. The smoke drifts, revealing a square that is broken… but
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER The immediate panic has shifted into frantic work. SOME tend to the wounded. OTHERS clear debris. Soldiers and civilians labor side by side. Keller stands with Harris and Vega, watching Lara as she
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EXT TRIAGE – EDGE OF SQUARE – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE – EDGE OF SQUARE – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE – EDGE OF SQUARE – SAME TIME Farid knots a bandage tight, then pushes to his feet, knees cracking. He spots Lara sitting on a broken step, alone for the first time in hours.
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EXT TRIAGE – QUIETER CORNER – TWILIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE – QUIETER CORNER – TWILIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE – QUIETER CORNER – TWILIGHT The sun is a faint smear behind the smoke. Lara steps away from the noise, toward a collapsed wall near the square’s edge. The Reaper waits there, half-merged with shadow.
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INT COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME
INT. COLLAPSED SHOPFRONT – SAME TIME QASIM lies propped on blankets, sweating, his breathing ragged. KAREEM sits nearby, rocking his baby, keeping half an eye on Qasim.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – NIGHT The square is running on fumes. Lanterns burn low. People move slower, exhaustion heavy in every step. LARA checks on a row of patients. Her hands tremble so badly
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EXT RUINED STREETS – APPROACH TO SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. RUINED STREETS – APPROACH TO SQUARE – NIGHT
EXT. RUINED STREETS – APPROACH TO SQUARE – NIGHT Halim’s squad moves with ghostlike efficiency. He raises a fist. The squad HALTS. He points two fingers left, two right. The team SPLITS into wings, circling the square like predators.
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EXT SQUARE’S NORTH ALLEY – SAME TIME
EXT. SQUARE’S NORTH ALLEY – SAME TIME
EXT. SQUARE’S NORTH ALLEY – SAME TIME Two of HALIM’S MEN crawl along the shadows, hugging the wall. They peek around the corner — see a small knot of civilians moving supplies. One soldier gestures: HOSTAGES.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS Lara tries to stand. Her legs will not obey. Her hands curl into claws, nails digging into her own skin. LARA
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER THAT NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER THAT NIGHT
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – LATER THAT NIGHT The immediate firefight has died down. Nader’s men have been pushed back or pinned. The square holds — barely.
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EXT NORTH ALLEY / MAKESHIFT HOLDING POINT – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ALLEY / MAKESHIFT HOLDING POINT – NIGHT
EXT. NORTH ALLEY / MAKESHIFT HOLDING POINT – NIGHT HALIM sits against a wall, wrists bound, leg bandaged tight. Rage simmers beneath his controlled exterior. KELLER stands over him. HARRIS nearby, watching the perimeter.
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EXT ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – LATER THAT NIGHT
EXT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – LATER THAT NIGHT
EXT. ENEMY FORWARD COMMAND – LATER THAT NIGHT The artillery ridge is quieter, guns resting like beasts between feeds. GENERAL NADER reviews a report on a tablet. Drone stills show:
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – WEE HOURS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – WEE HOURS
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – WEE HOURS The adrenaline has faded to a heavy, buzzing exhaustion. People patch walls, tie splints, share boiled water. The air feels… off.
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EXT TRIAGE – ANOTHER CORNER – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE – ANOTHER CORNER – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE – ANOTHER CORNER – SAME TIME KELLER and HARRIS stand near the damaged jeep, half in shadow. Harris’s arm is bandaged where the knife cut him earlier. HARRIS
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – MOMENTS LATER A strange, LOW HUM vibrates the air. People look up, unsettled. A VEHICLE somewhere in the distance — not close, but carrying sound — a TRUCK with LOUDSPEAKERS.
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EXT TRIAGE – QUIET SIDE – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE – QUIET SIDE – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. TRIAGE – QUIET SIDE – MOMENTS LATER Lara steps away from the others, around a half-collapsed wall. The Reaper follows, limping slightly now, as if his form is glitching.
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EXT LARA’S CORNER – SAME TIME
EXT. LARA’S CORNER – SAME TIME
EXT. LARA’S CORNER – SAME TIME Lara stands now, leaning on a chunk of wall. Her legs hold her, barely. She looks older in this half-light — like the war has aged her twenty years in two days.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – JUST BEFORE DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – JUST BEFORE DAWN
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – JUST BEFORE DAWN The first smear of orange touches the horizon. A distant RUMBLE that is not artillery — heavy trucks repositioning, something big being moved into place. Everyone feels it in their bones.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – SAME TIME
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – SAME TIME The square stirs. KELLER, FARID, LEILA, YARA and a handful of others stand near the edge, watching the faint silhouette of Lara in the distance.
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS Nader eyes Lara like he’s inspecting a glitchy program. NADER Kneel. Lara raises one eyebrow.
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – LARA’S POV – CONTINUOUS Her vision fractures again: — Future 1: She kneels. Nader shoots her in the head. The missile launches. — Future 2: She fights. He kills her. The missile launches.
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EXT RUINED BUILDING OVERLOOKING ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RUINED BUILDING OVERLOOKING ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RUINED BUILDING OVERLOOKING ROAD – CONTINUOUS Keller sees the tech’s hand go to the panel. KELLER They’re arming. That’s not conditional. That’s happening no
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS Everyone watches — soldiers, Keller’s team, civilians from afar. The Reaper looks up. His ticking falters.
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – MOMENTS LATER The battlefield hangs in stunned silence. Soldiers look around, lost. Some cross themselves. Others mutter prayers. A few drop to their knees.
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EXT SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SOUTH ROAD – CONTINUOUS Panic sweeps Nader’s soldiers. Fields of probability are failing them. Bullets misfire. Vehicles stall. One soldier rips off his helmet.
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EXT TRIAGE SQUARE – DAY (LATER)
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – DAY (LATER)
EXT. TRIAGE SQUARE – DAY (LATER) The sun is up. The city is broken, but not gone. Makeshift tents and tarps cover open spaces. Water is boiled. Food is shared.
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Grim Reaper

A young field doctor discovers she can bend probability to save the wounded — each rescue costing her lifespan and reality itself — and must decide whether to keep saving lives when a calculating enemy threatens to 'erase' her and everything she's changed. Other loglines ›

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script uniquely combines the visceral realism of warzone medical drama with supernatural horror elements, creating a fresh take on both genres. The central premise—a medic who can literally trade years of her life to save others—provides a powerful metaphor for medical ethics and sacrifice that transcends typical war narratives. The personification of Death as a bureaucratic entity being corrupted by human compassion offers philosophical depth rarely seen in genre films.

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OpenAI
 Recommend
Score 8.3
Gemini
 Recommend
Score 8.5
Grok
 Recommend
Score 8.3
Claude
 Recommend
Score 8.3
DeepSeek
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Score 8.3
Average Score: 8.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To refine your script, focus on clarifying the supernatural mechanics, such as the rules governing the Reaper and Lara's ability to bend probability, to ensure consistency and avoid audience confusion during key moments. Additionally, deepen Lara's backstory with specific personal details to make her motivations more relatable and emotionally resonant, while tightening repetitive action sequences to maintain pacing and heighten impact. These adjustments will strengthen the narrative's coherence and emotional depth, making the story more compelling and production-ready.
For Executives:
The script has strong value as a genre-blending war drama with supernatural elements, offering a unique premise that could attract niche audiences and critical acclaim, with solid market potential in festivals and streaming platforms. However, risks include potential audience confusion from unclear supernatural rules and repetitive pacing, which could limit broad appeal and commercial success if not addressed, as it might alienate mainstream viewers or require costly reshoots to fix logical inconsistencies.
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Story Facts
Genres:
War 40% Drama 50% Fantasy 30% Action 30%

Setting: Contemporary, during an ongoing war, A war-torn city, primarily in a triage area and surrounding urban ruins

Themes: Human Resilience and the Indomitable Spirit, Sacrifice and the Cost of Compassion, The Dehumanizing Nature of War vs. Persistent Humanity, Fate vs. Free Will (Determinism vs. Choice), The Burden of Leadership and Responsibility, The Nature of Reality and Perception, The Mythology of Heroes and Symbols, The Morality of Warfare and Military Strategy, The Limits of Knowledge and Control, The Search for Meaning and Legacy

Conflict & Stakes: Lara's struggle to save civilians amidst a war while facing supernatural consequences for her actions, with the lives of many at stake.

Mood: Tense and urgent, with moments of grim determination and introspection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The integration of supernatural elements with the harsh realities of war, particularly through the character of The Reaper.
  • Major Twist: Lara's ability to manipulate life and death through her choices, leading to unforeseen consequences and personal sacrifices.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of moral dilemmas in war, questioning the value of individual lives against strategic military decisions.
  • Distinctive Setting: A war-torn city that serves as both a battleground and a character in its own right, filled with tension and despair.
  • Unique Characters: Complex characters like Lara and The Reaper, who embody the struggle between life and death, and the moral complexities of war.

Comparable Scripts: The Reaper's Apprentice, The Leftovers, The Book Thief, A Monster Calls, The Nightingale, The Walking Dead, The Fault in Our Stars, The Giver, The Green Mile

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.15
Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's craft, focus on deepening antagonist characters like Nader and Halim by adding nuanced backstories and motivations, which will heighten conflict and emotional stakes. Additionally, tighten pacing in the middle sections by cutting redundant scenes and sharpening dialogue, ensuring the narrative maintains relentless tension and clarity in the supernatural elements to better serve Lara's arc and overall thematic depth.
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Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its emotional depth and exploration of sacrifice, but to enhance its craft, focus on smoothing out uneven pacing to maintain tension, clearly defining the rules of the supernatural elements for better integration with the realistic war setting, and deepening supporting characters' backstories to amplify emotional resonance and consequences of Lara's choices. This will create a more cohesive narrative that draws audiences deeper into the moral dilemmas without disjointed moments.
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Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals a strong foundation in character development, particularly with Lara as the protagonist, but opportunities exist to enhance emotional depth and arcs for all characters. Focus on exploring backstories, such as Lara's past traumas and Farid's motivations, to add layers to their journeys. Additionally, clarify transformation triggers and integrate more vulnerability in dialogue to heighten emotional resonance, ensuring that relationships drive the narrative and reinforce themes of sacrifice and humanity. This will make the script more engaging and impactful from a craft perspective.
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Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's emotional craft, incorporate greater variety in emotional tones by adding moments of humor and lighter interactions to counteract the pervasive tension and foreboding, particularly in Reaper-centric scenes. Deepen character backstories and internal conflicts for secondary figures like Farid and Qasim to foster stronger empathy, ensuring the supernatural elements enhance rather than dominate the human drama, ultimately creating a more balanced and resonant narrative that avoids emotional repetition and builds a deeper audience connection.
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Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script's analysis highlights a strong character arc and thematic depth, particularly in exploring individual agency versus fate. To enhance the craft, focus on integrating the philosophical conflict more evenly throughout the narrative rather than concentrating it in the later acts; this would build tension earlier and make Lara's internal and external struggles feel more immediate and engaging, preventing potential pacing issues and deepening emotional resonance for viewers.
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Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative standpoint, the script's themes are robust, but to elevate the craft, focus on refining the balance between the supernatural elements and the core human drama. Deepen Lara's emotional arc by adding more introspective scenes that explore her internal conflicts and relationships, ensuring that her defiance and sacrifices feel earned and nuanced rather than overly heroic. This will strengthen thematic coherence and prevent the Reaper's presence from overshadowing the grounded war narrative, making the story more relatable and impactful for audiences.
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Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's supernatural war narrative has strong potential, but inconsistencies in character development, story pacing, and plot logic dilute its impact. To improve, focus on gradual character arcs for authenticity, clarify supernatural rules early to avoid confusion, and balance tension with reflective moments to maintain pacing. Streamlining redundant elements and ensuring natural dialogue will enhance emotional depth and viewer engagement, making the story more cohesive and compelling.
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Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice effectively blends gritty realism with supernatural elements, creating a compelling narrative, but to enhance its craft, focus on tightening the pacing in supernatural sequences to avoid overwhelming the emotional core, and deepen character backstories through subtler dialogue to heighten audience investment in their moral dilemmas. This will strengthen the thematic resonance and make the story more universally relatable while preserving the raw authenticity.
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Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay showcases strong tension and moral depth in its war-torn narrative, but to refine it creatively, focus on enhancing dialogue with more authentic subtext, deepening character explorations to reveal internal conflicts, and expanding thematic elements for greater philosophical resonance, ultimately creating a more immersive and emotionally layered story.
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Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
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Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
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World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building effectively blends a gritty, realistic war-torn environment with supernatural elements, creating a compelling backdrop for themes of sacrifice and fate. To enhance the craft, focus on tightening the integration of supernatural aspects, like the Reaper's interventions, to ensure they feel organic and character-driven rather than contrived, which could deepen emotional resonance and avoid pacing issues in high-stakes scenes. Additionally, exploring more nuanced cultural and societal dynamics could add layers to character interactions, making the story more immersive and thematically rich.
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Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The scene pattern analysis reveals that while the script excels in emotional depth and supernatural innovation, it could improve by balancing reflective and philosophical tones with more action-driven sequences to avoid pacing slowdowns and maintain momentum. Varying character responses and refining humorous dialogue would add unpredictability and versatility, ensuring the narrative doesn't become formulaic or overly reliant on intense emotions, ultimately enhancing engagement and emotional resonance.
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Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.
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