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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT PUBLISHING HOUSE RECEPTION AREA – DAY
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INT WAITING ROOM DAY
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INT OFFICE CONTINUOUS
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EXT COMMUTER TRAIN STATION
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INT DINER DAY
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EXT BEACH DAY
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EXT TRAIN STATION EVENING
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INT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - A FEW MINUTES LATER
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INT JOEL'S CAR NIGHT
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INT BOOKSTORE NIGHT
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EXT NEW YORK STREET DAY
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INT HALLWAY DAY
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INT MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE DAY
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INT ROB AND CARRIES LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT NEW YORK STREET DAY
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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INT JOEL'S CAR CONTINUOUS
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT ZOO DAY
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INT BAR NIGHT
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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INT CHINESE RESTAURANT NIGHT
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INT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT STREET NIGHT
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EXT CHARLES RIVER NIGHT
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EXT FOREST – DAY
27 62
INT KITCHEN DAY
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INT MIERZWIAK'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT KITCHEN DAY
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT KITCHEN DAY
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INT CAR NIGHT
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EXT SCHOOLYARD AFTERNOON
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EXT BEACH DAY
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INT RESTAURANT NIGHT
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRY ROAD DAY
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT CHINESE RESTAURANT NIGHT
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INT RESTAURANT NIGHT
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INT LACUNA RECEPTION AREA NIGHT
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT .
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INT BORDER'S BOOKSTORE NIGHT
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INT BORDER'S BOOKSTORE NIGHT
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INT ROB AND CARRIE'S CAR NIGHT
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
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INT ROB AND CARRIE'S KITCHEN DAY
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INT HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM - EARLY MORNING
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INT LACUNA RECEPTION AREA DAY
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
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INT MARY'S APARTMENT MORNING
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EXT CHARLES RIVER NIGHT
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EXT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT DAY
55 113
INT MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE MOMENTS LATER
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INT OFFICE DAY
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INT MARY'S APARTMENT DAY
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EXT PARK AFTERNOON
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INT COMMUTING TUBE DAY
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INT TUBE NIGHT
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
INT PUBLISHING HOUSE RECEPTION AREA – DAY
INT. PUBLISHING HOUSE RECEPTION AREA – DAY
INT. PUBLISHING HOUSE RECEPTION AREA – DAY It's grand and modern. Random House-Knopf-Taschen is etched on the wall in large gold letters. An old woman enters carrying a tattered manuscript, maybe a thousand pages. She seems haunted, hollow-eyed, sickly. The young receptionist, dressed in a shiny, stretchy one-
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INT WAITING ROOM DAY
INT. WAITING ROOM - DAY
INT. WAITING ROOM - DAY SUBTITLE: FIFTY YEARS EARLIER Every doctor's office waiting room; chairs against the wall, magazines on end tables, a sad-looking potted plant, generic seascape paintings on the walls. The receptionist, Mary, 25, can he seen
3 6
INT OFFICE CONTINUOUS
INT. OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
INT. OFFICE - CONTINUOUS Mierzwiak directs Clementine to a chair next to a coffee table and a conspicuously placed box of tissues. Mierzwiak sits across from her. He smiles. MIERZWIAK
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EXT COMMUTER TRAIN STATION
EXT. COMMUTER TRAIN STATION
EXT. COMMUTER TRAIN STATION SUBTITLE: TWO WEEKS LATER The platform is crowded with business commuters. Joel is among them. He is in his 30's, gaunt, and holding a briefcase. The platform across the tracks from him is empty. Suddenly he turns and makes his
5 9
INT DINER DAY
INT. DINER - DAY
INT. DINER - DAY It's a local tourist place, but off-season empty. Joel sits in a booth and eats a grilled cheese sandwich and a bowl of tomato soup. An elderly couple drink coffee at the counter. Clementine enters, looks around, takes off her hood. Joel glances at her bright blue
6 10
EXT BEACH DAY
EXT. BEACH - DAY
EXT. BEACH - DAY Joel stares out at the ocean. Far down the beach Clementine stares at it, too. Joel glances sideways at her then back at the ocean. EXT. MONTAUK TRAIN STATION PLATFORM - LATE AFTERNOON Joel sits on a bench waiting for the train. Clementine enters the
7 17
EXT TRAIN STATION EVENING
EXT. TRAIN STATION - EVENING
EXT. TRAIN STATION - EVENING The doors open and Joel emerges -along with others. He heads to the parking lot, arrives at his car. There's a big dented scrape along the driver's side. He gets in. © 2003 Focus Features
8 20
INT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - A FEW MINUTES LATER
INT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - A FEW MINUTES LATER
INT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - A FEW MINUTES LATER Joel stands in the living room, somewhat nervously. He tries to calm himself by focusing on the surroundings. He looks at the books on her shelves. Clementine is in the kitchen. We see her as she passes by the doorway several times, preparing drinks and chatting.
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INT JOEL'S CAR NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S CAR - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S CAR - NIGHT Joel speeds through the suburban Rockville Center neighborhood. There is no snow on the ground. He seems different, somehow foggy and disoriented SUBTITLE THREE DAYS EARLIER
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INT BOOKSTORE NIGHT
INT. BOOKSTORE - NIGHT
INT. BOOKSTORE - NIGHT Joel sits in the bookstore coffee shop. It's a jarring transition, visually and emotionally. Joel is in the midst of some traumatic state of mind. He fingers the vial with the pink pill in it as he watches Clementine stack books on shelves. Her hair is bright orange
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EXT NEW YORK STREET DAY
EXT. NEW YORK STREET - DAY
EXT. NEW YORK STREET - DAY Joel trudges along carrying two big trash bags full of stuff. He's been crying. He looks behind him and finds himself looking out the window of his apartment at the dark van on the snowy street. He turns back to the New York Street and spots the address he was looking for:
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INT HALLWAY DAY
INT. HALLWAY - DAY
INT. HALLWAY - DAY Joel looks for an office number. He finds it. The plaque on the door reads Lacuna Ltd. Joel enters. INT. WAITING ROOM - DAY Joel enters the Lacuna waiting room. Mary sits in the reception area.
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INT MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE DAY
INT. MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE - DAY Mierzwiak sits with Joel in the sitting area. MIERZWIAK So we'll need you to go home and bring in everything you ever received from Clementine and anything that might
14 40
INT ROB AND CARRIES LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. ROB AND CARRIES LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. ROB AND CARRIES LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Joel sits across from Rob and Carrie, mid-40'S. © 2003 Focus Features JOEL
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EXT NEW YORK STREET DAY
EXT. NEW YORK STREET - DAY
EXT. NEW YORK STREET - DAY Joel looks for an address, INT. ELEVATOR - DAY Joel gets off on the sixth floor. He searches for a room number. As he turns the corner, he sees that the hallway is faded, vague and
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Joel distractedly reads a book, checks the clock, goes back to the book. The door opens. He looks up. Clementine is staggering in, drunk. CLEMENTINE
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INT JOEL'S CAR CONTINUOUS
INT. JOEL'S CAR - CONTINUOUS
INT. JOEL'S CAR - CONTINUOUS Joel drives to catch up to Clementine. He rolls down his window to talk to her. JOEL Let me drive you home
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INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Joel and Clementine sit and eat dinner in front of the TV. It's hard to make out what they're watching. They sit on opposite ends of the couch. They look bored. The scene quickly degenerates. The room fades.
19 48
EXT ZOO DAY
EXT. ZOO - DAY
EXT. ZOO - DAY Joel and Clementine walk around unhappily. They barely look at the animals. Clementine watches parents with babies. JOEL Oh shit. I remember this.
20 49
INT BAR NIGHT
INT. BAR - NIGHT
INT. BAR - NIGHT It's noisy and crowded. Joel and Clementine sit at a small table. She is drunk and stating off, blankly. JOEL So, um —
21 50
INT JOEL'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Patrick opens the door. Mary stands there with in a winter coat, carrying a backpack. MARY (coolly)
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INT CHINESE RESTAURANT NIGHT
INT. CHINESE RESTAURANT - NIGHT
INT. CHINESE RESTAURANT - NIGHT Joel and Clementine eat dinner in silence. Joel looks around at other couples in the restaurant. Some seem happy and engaged. Others seem bored with each other. He turns back to his food. JOEL VOICE-OVER
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INT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Candles are lit. Joel and Clementine are under a blanket on the living room rug listening to music. CLEMENTINE Joely...
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EXT STREET NIGHT
EXT. STREET - NIGHT
EXT. STREET - NIGHT Patrick, bundled up and carrying a full backpack, trudges through the snow. INT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS Clementine watches out the window as Patrick nears. She's crying. He
25 59
EXT CHARLES RIVER NIGHT
EXT. CHARLES RIVER - NIGHT
EXT. CHARLES RIVER - NIGHT Joel and Clementine lie together holding hands on the frozen river. They look up at the stars. JOEL ... die right now. Clem. I'm just... happy. I've never felt
26 60
EXT FOREST – DAY
EXT. FOREST – DAY
EXT. FOREST – DAY Joel and Clementine are hiking, Clementine in front. CLEMENTINE Such a beautiful view. JOEL
27 62
INT KITCHEN DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY The kitchen is dated and vague. Joel and Clementine are in an oversized playpen; they're adults but small. Joel wears footsie pajamas with some vague little animals on them. He holds a a red furry huckleberry hound doll. Clementine is still in her panties and
28 64
INT MIERZWIAK'S BEDROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. MIERZWIAK'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. MIERZWIAK'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS The room is dark. A groggy Mierzwiak is in bed on the phone. His wife lies beside him, eyes open, listening. MIERZWIAK Stan? What's going on?
29 65
INT KITCHEN DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY Joel and Clementine are in the playpen. Joel's oversized mother reaches down as she hurries by and pats Joel on the head. MOTHER How's my baby boy?
30 67
INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT Stan works on trying to get the signal back. His hair is combed and he's dressed neatly, looking professional but still stoned. Mary is pacing nervously to and from the window, looking out into the night. She's dressed also, and she's wearing more make-up now. Her hair is
31 68
INT KITCHEN DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
INT. KITCHEN - DAY Joel is being bathed in the oversized sink by his oversized mother. Clementine sits in the water with him, laughing. The mother doesn't seem to see her. MOTHER
32 69
INT CAR NIGHT
INT. CAR - NIGHT
INT. CAR - NIGHT Clementine and Joel laugh as they try to give voice to what the characters on the screen are saying. CLEMENTINE But can't you see... I love you, Antoine.
33 70
EXT SCHOOLYARD AFTERNOON
EXT. SCHOOLYARD - AFTERNOON
EXT. SCHOOLYARD - AFTERNOON Joel, now the size of a junior high school kid and dressed accordingly, is peering around the corner of the school building toward the bike rack. Clementine is with him, dressed as she was in the parked car.
34 71
EXT BEACH DAY
EXT. BEACH - DAY
EXT. BEACH - DAY It's cold. Joel and Clementine walk, all bundled up. She points at a house up the beach. © 2003 Focus Features
35 72
INT RESTAURANT NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT - NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT - NIGHT Joel and Clementine are laughing as she blows out the candle on a slice of cheesecake in front of her. Joel hands her a small wrapped box. JOEL
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT Mierzwiak works the equipment. He has located a small area of light in the brain imaging and eradicates them. MIERZWIAK I'm getting the hang of it. I still understand it. But I'm
37 77
EXT COUNTRY ROAD DAY
EXT. COUNTRY ROAD - DAY
EXT. COUNTRY ROAD - DAY Joel and Clementine walking, hand-in-hand, look up simultaneously. INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM – CONTINUOUS Mary looks confusedly at Howard. MARY
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - NIGHT It's deathly silent as Mierzwiak and Stan work on completing the job. Mierzwiak locates a light hidden very deep in the map of Joel's brain. He targets it. EXT. ROWBOAT - DAY
39 80
INT CHINESE RESTAURANT NIGHT
INT. CHINESE RESTAURANT - NIGHT
INT. CHINESE RESTAURANT - NIGHT Joel finds himself eating Chinese food and sitting across from Clementine. He is ragged and jarred. JOEL I'm done, Clem. I'm just going to ride it out. Hiding is
40 81
INT RESTAURANT NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT - NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT - NIGHT Clementine wears a generic black dress now. JOEL Right. Something black though. CLEMENTINE
41 82
INT LACUNA RECEPTION AREA NIGHT
INT. LACUNA RECEPTION AREA - NIGHT
INT. LACUNA RECEPTION AREA - NIGHT Mary enters the dark room, frazzled. She flips on the fluorescent lights and searches the file folders, finds one with her name on it. Her jaw drops. With a shaky hand, she puts the tape into the player on her desk and presses 'play.'
42 83
INT JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT .
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT .
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - NIGHT . Joel sits in the quiet living room. The scene is fading. JOEL Naomi. © 2003 Focus Features
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INT BORDER'S BOOKSTORE NIGHT
INT. BORDER'S BOOKSTORE - NIGHT
INT. BORDER'S BOOKSTORE - NIGHT Joel talks to Clementine. The scene is fogging over. JOEL I told her today I need to end it. CLEMENTINE
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INT BORDER'S BOOKSTORE NIGHT
INT. BORDER'S BOOKSTORE - NIGHT
INT. BORDER'S BOOKSTORE - NIGHT Joel enters, looks around. There's no sign of Clementine. Joel approaches a male employee. JOEL Is there a Clementine who works here?
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INT ROB AND CARRIE'S CAR NIGHT
INT. ROB AND CARRIE'S CAR - NIGHT
INT. ROB AND CARRIE'S CAR - NIGHT Joel sits forlornly in the back seat. Rob drives and Carrie sits in the front passenger seat. The car stops in front of Joel's apartment building. JOEL
46 90
INT JOEL'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON
INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON Joel is at his closet, putting on a sweater. Naomi is at the dining room table, papers spread out before her, writing. Joel turns and watches her for a moment. JOEL
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INT ROB AND CARRIE'S KITCHEN DAY
INT. ROB AND CARRIE'S KITCHEN - DAY
INT. ROB AND CARRIE'S KITCHEN - DAY Faded. Carrie and Joel sit at the table with coffee. CARRIE Who was the girl you walked off with? JOEL
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INT HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. HOUSE - CONTINUOUS Joel enters the darkened and Clementine closes the door behind him. © 2003 Focus Features JOEL CLEMENTINE
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INT JOEL'S BEDROOM - EARLY MORNING
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - EARLY MORNING
INT. JOEL'S BEDROOM - EARLY MORNING Howard watches the monitor. The last specks of light are fading. It grows dark. He is tired, his eyes are hollow, He turns to Stan, who is staring out the window at the dawn. HOWARD
50 103
INT LACUNA RECEPTION AREA DAY
INT. LACUNA RECEPTION AREA - DAY
INT. LACUNA RECEPTION AREA - DAY Mary does paperwork at her desk. She looks through her reception window at the sad people waiting in the lobby with their bags of stuff. INT. MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
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INT RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT Joel sits across from Naomi. NAOMI (oddly cautious) So. . . you haven't been involved with anyone in all this
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INT MARY'S APARTMENT MORNING
INT. MARY'S APARTMENT - MORNING
INT. MARY'S APARTMENT - MORNING Mary gets out of bed. She has been crying all night. She's a wreck. She puts on some coffee then crosses into the living room area. Sitting there are piles of the files from work. She pulls the top one out, copies the name and address onto an envelope stuffs the file and
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EXT CHARLES RIVER NIGHT
EXT. CHARLES RIVER - NIGHT
EXT. CHARLES RIVER - NIGHT Clementine steps out onto it. Joel follows nervously. CLEMENTINE Don't worry. It's really solid this time of year. JOEL
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EXT CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT DAY
EXT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - DAY
EXT. CLEMENTINE'S APARTMENT - DAY Joel drops Clementine off. She kisses him. INT. JOEL'S APARTMENT - A FEW MINUTES LATER Joel enters with his mail. He opens a manila envelope, reads the enclosed file, sticks the cassette tape in his stereo, listens. Joel
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INT MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE MOMENTS LATER
INT. MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE - MOMENTS LATER
INT. MIERZWIAK'S OFFICE - MOMENTS LATER Stan enters. Mierzwiak is pale and pacing. MIERZWIAK She should not have done this, Stan. As mad as she was... as justifiably --
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INT OFFICE DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY Joel works over his light box. His phone rings. JOEL Hi, it's Joel. CLEMENTINE'S VOICE
57 115
INT MARY'S APARTMENT DAY
INT. MARY'S APARTMENT - DAY
INT. MARY'S APARTMENT - DAY Mary opens the door. Stan stands there with two cups of take-out coffee. MARY Oh.
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EXT PARK AFTERNOON
EXT. PARK - AFTERNOON
EXT. PARK - AFTERNOON Vague elliptical images of a young girl on a swing. SAD WOMAN'S VOICE I was by myself in the park because my friend Davia was sick that day. I was on a swing. There was this smiling man
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INT COMMUTING TUBE DAY
INT. COMMUTING TUBE - DAY
INT. COMMUTING TUBE - DAY The old woman is staring off blankly, her giant manuscript in her lap, as she travels over the New York skyline. We move into her eyes. INT. VAGUE SPACE Vague reenactments of memories intermingle in this undefined space:
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INT TUBE NIGHT
INT. TUBE - NIGHT
INT. TUBE - NIGHT The old woman (Mary) travels in. the commuter tube over Manhattan. It's late, the tube is mostly empty. She has earphones on. SECOND OLD WOMAN (CLEMENTINE) (V.O.) I remember Joel and I were having breakfast --

Eternal Sunshin of the Spotless Mind

After a volatile breakup, a heartbroken man discovers his ex has paid to erase him from her mind — he follows the clinic into his own memories to stop the procedure and, in the process, relives the best and worst of love.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its revolutionary approach to the romance genre by blending high-concept science fiction with intimate psychological drama. Unlike traditional love stories, it explores relationships through the lens of memory manipulation, creating a profound meditation on how love persists even when memories are erased. The non-linear structure that moves backward through a relationship's dissolution while the protagonist fights to preserve it creates an emotionally resonant and intellectually stimulating experience that challenges conventional storytelling.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Highly Recommend
Grok
 Highly Recommend
Gemini
 Highly Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Highly Recommend
Average Score: 9.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The screenplay's core — the memory-erasure conceit married to Joel and Clementine's messy, lived-in romance — is distinctive and emotionally rich. To elevate it further, tighten and deepen the Lacuna subplot so the ethical stakes land as powerfully as the personal ones. Specifically, strengthen Mary’s motivation and show the immediate and downstream consequences of her decision to distribute files (one or two targeted scenes: an intimate flashback that makes her whistleblowing inevitable, and a compact aftermath beat that shows personal cost and institutional fallout). Also give Naomi and a couple of key secondary players one clarifying beat so their choices feel earned. These are surgical, creative fixes that preserve the script’s poetry while removing the thinness that critics will flag as a plot gap.
For Executives:
This is a high-value, festival- and awards-friendly screenplay: original premise, strong lead roles, and distinctive visual opportunities that make it attractive to an auteur director and star talent. The principal risk is not marketability but perceived narrative sloppiness around Lacuna’s consequences and Mary/secondary arcs — critics and discerning audiences may read those as plot holes. Fortunately the fixes are low-to-mid budget (add 1–3 scenes that solidify motive and fallout) and will materially reduce risk without altering the film’s tone. Position and market it as a smart, adult romance with a speculative hook; emphasize the emotional stakes in marketing and the director’s visual signature in festival positioning.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Romance 50% Science Fiction 30% Fantasy 25%

Setting: Contemporary, with elements of the near future, New York City, including various modern and surreal settings such as a publishing house, doctor's office, commuter tubes, and intimate apartments.

Themes: Memory and Erasure, Love and Connection, Identity and Selfhood, Emotional Pain and Mental Health, The Cyclical Nature of Relationships and Life, Truth and Illusion, The Search for Meaning and Happiness

Conflict & Stakes: The central conflict revolves around Joel's emotional struggle with his relationship with Clementine and the ethical implications of memory erasure, with the stakes being the loss of meaningful connections and the consequences of forgetting one's past.

Mood: Melancholic and introspective, with moments of humor and surrealism.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of memory erasure as a therapeutic procedure raises ethical questions and personal dilemmas.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that Clementine has also undergone memory erasure, complicating their relationship further.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of surreal visuals to represent memory decay and emotional states enhances the storytelling.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between the cold, clinical environments of the memory clinic and the warmth of personal memories.
  • Character Depth: Complex characters with relatable struggles that resonate with audiences.

Comparable Scripts: Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, Being John Malkovich, Her, The Science of Sleep, Synecdoche, New York, Anomalisa, The Notebook, Lost in Translation, The Fountain

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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.7
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~34% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~4,107 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Character Development (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.8
Typical rewrite gain: +0.7 in Conflict (Script Level)
Gets you ~34% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~687 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.7 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Dialogue
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Dialogue score: 8.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Dialogue
Gets you ~19% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,902 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Dialogue by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 8.30
Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's core emotional engine — Joel and Clementine's relationship — is powerful and original, but its impact is being undercut by supporting characters whose motives and stakes feel underdeveloped (Stan, Patrick, Mary, Mierzwiak). Strengthen those secondary arcs so they actively shape the central conflict: give each supporting character a clear want, a past that explains their choices, and at least one scene that shows the consequences of Lacuna's work on them. Also tighten transitions through small, consistent cinematic cues (sound motifs, color shifts, prop beats) so the non‑linear memory sequences read emotionally rather than just stylistically. These targeted rewrites will deepen theme, clarify stakes, and make the emotional payoff far more resonant.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful central idea and two compelling leads, but the formal experimentation (nonlinear memory erasure) sometimes undercuts emotional clarity. The most effective fixes are craft-based: deepen a few key backstory moments so Joel and Clementine's choices feel earned, and tighten/clarify the transitions between memory and present so the audience can follow the emotional through-line. Use recurring sensory anchors (sound motifs, objects, or visual cues) and prune repetitive scenes that don't advance character or stakes. Small structural edits will preserve the film's inventive voice while making its emotional payoff more immediate and humane.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong around Joel and Clementine—their emotional beats land and provide the script's core. The areas that need tightening are the Lacuna subplot and its personnel: Howard (Mierzwiak) currently reads as morally ambiguous but inert, and Mary/Stan function as important thematic vectors without decisive arcs. To strengthen the script, heighten Howard’s moral stakes (force a concrete, costly choice) and make Mary the active conscience whose choices produce clear consequences. Trim or rework scenes that only exposit; instead show decisions and fallout on-screen so the theme (memory, responsibility, the ethics of erasure) is emotionally and dramatically felt, not merely explained in voice‑over or documents.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
Your script delivers a powerful emotional core — especially in the Joel/Clementine beats and the memory-erasure set pieces — but risks overwhelming viewers by sustaining very high-intensity sadness across long stretches (roughly scenes 9–35). To strengthen impact, create clearer emotional contrast: expand and deepen lighter, joyful or humorous moments (extend diner/train/first-meeting scenes, make happy memories more vivid), vary the kinds of sadness (nostalgia, regret, loneliness) so it feels textured rather than monotonous, and give Lacuna staff small personal stakes to humanize procedural scenes. These changes will preserve the screenplay’s emotional truth while improving pacing and audience endurance.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The goals analysis shows the screenplay’s emotional engine is Joel’s internal journey from avoidance to acceptance — and the central philosophical question is Memory vs. Identity. To strengthen the script, sharpen Joel’s throughline: make his changing internal stakes and the moment of choice clearer and better signposted so the audience can feel each step of his transformation. Tighten or clarify memory-sequence transitions (and supporting beats with Mary/Howard/Stan) so that the thematic payoff—choosing to live with painful memories rather than erase them—lands with emotional clarity rather than conceptual confusion.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core — that you cannot truly erase pain without losing parts of yourself — is powerful and clear. Strengthen it by tightening the throughline: make the choice to erase (and its consequences) feel earned for each character, and dramatize the alternative (acceptance/integration) with concrete beats. Simplify or clarify the nonlinear memory-hopping so the audience can follow emotional causality (not just a collage of vignette-memories). Give sensory anchors and recurring motifs to help memory-scenes land emotionally, and tighten secondary arcs (Mary, Stan, Mierzwiak) so they reflect and complicate Joel and Clementine's primary moral choices rather than distract from them.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core emotional engine — a couple trying to hold onto love while memories are surgically erased — is powerful, but the audience is repeatedly pulled out of the story by unclear mechanics and uneven characterization. Your priority should be to codify the rules of the Lacuna procedure (what can/can't be erased, how traces remain, how/why clients can re-encounter each other) and then rework scenes so every character beat follows from that logic. Once the procedure's rules are fixed, prune redundant emotional set-pieces (particularly multiple similar Clementine outbursts) and tighten dialogue so shifts in tone or vulnerability feel earned rather than abrupt.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a strong, distinctive voice—melancholic, introspective, and quietly surreal—that gives the material emotional weight. To strengthen the script craft-wise, preserve that tonal signature but tighten the structure: streamline repetitive memory-erasure beats, sharpen scene-to-scene causal clarity, and increase active, character-driven beats that push the story forward. Make sure each fading memory or poetic image advances an emotional choice or stakes for Joel (or reveals new information about Clementine) so the mood never becomes self-indulgent at the expense of narrative momentum.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You already have a powerful emotional core and memorable set pieces. The highest-leverage rewrite is to sharpen how that emotion is delivered: tighten dialogue so it carries more subtext, deepen characters' interior logic so their choices feel earned, and streamline scene pacing so the non-linear memory work reads as purposeful rather than diffuse. Practical steps: cut overt exposition, let small physical details and contradictions reveal who the characters are, and workshop key scenes aloud to find the unsaid beats that will make the audience feel rather than be told.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is a strong blend of intimate romance and speculative tech, but it risks alienating the audience if the emotional logic is swallowed by surreal set-pieces. Focus on anchoring the big, dreamlike memory sequences with clear sensory rules and tighter cause-and-effect: make the memory-erasure technology's mechanics (what can/cannot be erased, how memories decay, sensory markers) consistent and emotionally consequential. Trim or clarify scenes that drift into ‘vague’ or repetitive decay so every surreal beat advances character stakes — especially Joel’s agency — and preserves the bittersweet tone without confusing the viewer.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your screenplay’s core strength is emotional depth and character change, often amplified by surreal textures. However, quiet, reflective scenes frequently coincide with lowered external stakes, producing uneven pacing. To tighten the script, consciously balance introspective sequences with small-but-clear external consequences or micro-conflicts (or use dialogue to create tension), and lean into the surreal as a deliberate stylistic signature rather than an accidental effect. That will preserve the film’s emotional intimacy while maintaining forward momentum and audience investment.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.