Beetlejuice
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Promo
USP: Discover a whimsical and charming tale of love, loss, and the afterlife in this innovative script that explores the supernatural through a unique blend of humor, drama, and dark comedy. With its distinctive characters, including the ghostly Maitlands and the eccentric bio-exorcist Betelgeuse, the story offers a fresh take on the haunted house genre. The script's unique voice emphasizes the importance of home and family, creating an intimate and cozy atmosphere that draws the audience in. Through its detailed narrative descriptions and engaging dialogue, the script explores complex emotions and supernatural themes in a fresh and original way. This enchanting story is sure to captivate audiences with its blend of heartfelt moments, eerie suspense, and unexpected twists, making it a must-read for fans of the paranormal and beyond.
Overview
Genres: Comedy, Fantasy, Horror, Drama, Mystery, Supernatural, Musical
Setting: Contemporary, Winter River, Connecticut and the afterlife
Overview: The screenplay for Beetlejuice showcases a unique and imaginative take on the supernatural comedy genre, with strengths in originality, creativity, and character development. While the dialogue is witty and engaging, there is room for improvement in conveying emotions and unique voices consistently. The unpredictable plot keeps the audience intrigued, but there are opportunities to enhance the emotional depth of the characters and the resolution of conflicts.
Themes: Ghosts and Afterlife, Home and Belonging, Family and Relationships
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflict is between the Maitlands and Betelgeuse, as the Maitlands try to get rid of him and Betelgeuse tries to marry Lydia. The stakes are high for the Maitlands, as they want to reclaim their home and move on to the afterlife. For Lydia, the stakes are also high, as she must deal with the supernatural forces in her home and protect her family.
Overall Mood: Fantasy and Comedy
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21, 22, 23, 24, 25, 26, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 34, 35, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40, 41, 42, 43, 44, 45, 46, 47, 48, 49, 50, 51, 52, 53, 54, 55, 56, 57, 58, 59, 60, 61, 62, 63, 64, 65, 66, 67, 68, 69, 70, 71, 72, 73, 74, 75, 76, 77, 78, 79, 80, 81, 82, 83, 84, 85, 86, 87, 88, 89, 90, 91, 92, 93, 94, 95, 96, 97, 98, 99, 100: Fantasy and Comedy
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: Betelgeuse is a standout character with a unique and memorable personality
- Plot Twist : The Maitlands become ghosts in their own home, adding a unique twist to the afterlife theme
- Distinctive Setting : The afterlife and the supernatural elements add a distinctive and innovative setting to the story
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Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$20-30 million
Target Audience Demographics: Families with children, fans of fantasy and comedy
Marketability: This screenplay has a unique blend of fantasy and comedy that has the potential to attract a wide audience and generate buzz. The character of Betelgeuse is a standout and has the potential to become a cultural icon.
The supernatural elements and the unique blend of genres make this screenplay a compelling choice for audiences. The diverse cast and relevant themes also add to its appeal.
The Maitlands and Lydia are compelling characters with a gripping storyline. The supernatural elements and the afterlife theme make this screenplay relevant and engaging for audiences.
Profit Potential: High, due to strong appeal to a wide family audience and potential for award nominations for its unique blend of genres and innovative ideas.
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Screenplay Analysis
- Originality_score is exceptionally high, indicating a unique and creative concept.
- Engagement_score is also strong, suggesting the screenplay has a compelling narrative that keeps the reader invested.
- Plot_rating is relatively low, so focusing on developing a more engaging and unpredictable plot could be beneficial.
- Formatting_score and Structure_score are significantly lower, implying that the screenplay might benefit from a review of its formatting and structure.
- Dialogue_rating is moderate; working on refining dialogue to make it more impactful and natural could enhance the storytelling.
The writer's style appears to be more intuitive, with higher dialogue and character development percentiles, but could benefit from more focus on concept and plot development.
Balancing Elements- The writer could work on balancing the plot with character development and dialogue to create a more cohesive and engaging narrative.
- Improving formatting and structure can help create a better flow and pacing in the screenplay.
Intuitive
Overall AssessmentThe screenplay demonstrates a unique concept and engaging narrative, but could benefit from improvements in plot development, formatting, structure, and dialogue.
How scenes compare to the Scripts in our Library
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Percentile | Before | After |
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Scene Originality | 8.98 | 94 | Arsenic and old lace : 8.97 | Inglorious Basterds: 8.98 |
Scene Concept | 8.4 | 88 | The Greatest Showman: 8.3 | fight Club: 8.4 |
Script Structure | 8.50 | 88 | Hot Fuzz: 8.25 | the dark knight rises: 8.50 |
Script Visual Impact | 8.25 | 64 | KILLING ZOE: 8.00 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.25 |
Script Originality | 8.50 | 63 | Swingers: 8.25 | face/off: 8.50 |
Scene Unpredictability | 7.62 | 61 | El Mariachi: 7.60 | Heathers: 7.62 |
Scene Engagement | 8.98 | 54 | Coco: 8.97 | Mr. Smith goes to Washington: 8.98 |
Script Conflict | 7.75 | 51 | Inception: 7.50 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.75 |
1 | 50 | - | The Founder: 1 | |
Script Theme | 8.25 | 47 | Stranger Things: 8.00 | the dark knight rises: 8.25 |
Overall Script | 8.00 | 39 | Mo: 7.90 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Pacing | 8.21 | 36 | Thor: 8.20 | Birdman: 8.21 |
Scene High Stakes | 7.0 | 34 | Hot Fuzz: 6.9 | Bonnie and Clyde: 7.0 |
Scene Story Forward | 7.9 | 34 | The Greatest Showman: 7.8 | Scott pilgrim vs. the world: 7.9 |
Scene Dialogue | 7.5 | 33 | Witness: 7.4 | Titanic: 7.5 |
Scene Conflict Level | 7.2 | 31 | Zootopia: 7.1 | Bonnie and Clyde: 7.2 |
Script Emotional Impact | 7.50 | 28 | Midsommar: 7.25 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.50 |
Scene Internal Goal | 8.00 | 27 | KILLING ZOE: 7.98 | fight Club: 8.00 |
Scene Character Changes | 6.3 | 25 | Swingers: 6.2 | Black panther: 6.3 |
Script Characters | 7.75 | 20 | Inception: 7.50 | Blade Runner: 7.75 |
Scene External Goal | 7.05 | 20 | Killers of the flower moon: 7.04 | Shaun of the Dead: 7.05 |
Script Structure | 8.02 | 15 | Poor Things: 8.00 | fight Club: 8.02 |
Scene Plot | 7.4 | 14 | Almost Famous: 7.3 | the pursuit of happyness: 7.4 |
Scene Emotional Impact | 6.8 | 12 | Ghostbusters: 6.7 | Madmen: 6.8 |
Script Premise | 7.25 | 12 | Boyz n the hood: 7.00 | the 5th element: 7.25 |
Scene Characters | 7.8 | 9 | Midsommar: 7.7 | scream : 7.8 |
Scene Overall | 8.0 | 8 | Fleabag: 7.9 | the pursuit of happyness: 8.0 |
Scene Formatting | 7.88 | 3 | Die Hard: 7.83 | Beetlejuice: 7.88 |
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its whimsical and charming dialogue, detailed narrative descriptions, and focus on domestic scenes and relationships.
Best representation: Scene 1 - The Maitlands' Morning: A Real Estate Offer and a Refusal. This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases all of the key elements of the writer's style: the whimsical and charming dialogue, the detailed narrative descriptions, and the focus on domestic scenes and relationships.
Memorable Lines:
- Betelgeuse: Say it once... Betelgeuse. Say it twice... Betelgeuse. The third time's a charm... Betelgeuse! Come on down! (Scene 13)
- Juno: You're dead. (Scene 18)
- Delia: That was the single most unattractive window treatment I have ever seen in the entire of my existence. (Scene 8)
- Betelgeuse: You just have to say it! (Scene 35)
- Juno: Haunted houses don't come easy. (Scene 19)
Writing Style:
The writing style across this screenplay is characterized by a blend of supernatural elements, dark humor, and quirky characters, with a strong emphasis on unique world-building and emotional depth. The narrative features a distinct voice that combines fantastical and comedic elements, creating a captivating and immersive atmosphere.
Style Similarities:
- Tim Burton
- Guillermo del Toro
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
Beetlejuice is a well-crafted and imaginative screenplay that artfully blends elements of horror, comedy, and family drama. The strong character development, world-building, and visual set pieces make it a compelling and engaging read. While there are a few areas for improvement, such as pacing and comedic refinement, the screenplay's strengths outweigh its weaknesses, making it a recommended read for producers and studios seeking a unique and entertaining supernatural comedy-drama.
- The screenplay demonstrates strong character development, with the Maitlands and Lydia Deetz undergoing meaningful transformations throughout the story. high
- The worldbuilding in the afterlife sequences is highly imaginative and effectively establishes the rules and mechanics of the supernatural elements. high ( Scene 13 Scene 14 Scene 15 Scene 16 )
- The screenplay balances humor, horror, and heartfelt moments effectively, creating a tonally rich and engaging narrative. high
- The set pieces and visual effects, such as the Sandworm and Betelgeuse's transformations, are creative and well-executed. medium ( Scene 28 Scene 29 Scene 30 Scene 31 )
- The interactions between the living and the dead characters are well-developed, leading to compelling conflicts and resolutions. high ( Scene 24 Scene 25 Scene 26 Scene 27 )
- The pacing could be tightened in certain sections, particularly the middle act, to maintain a more consistent momentum. medium
- Some of the comedic beats could be refined to ensure they land more effectively without becoming too broad or over-the-top. medium
- While the character arcs are strong, there could be more development and exploration of the Deetz family's motivations and backstories. low
- The screenplay could benefit from a deeper exploration of the rules and implications of the afterlife, as presented in the Handbook for the Recently Deceased. medium
- The climactic sequence, where the Maitlands and Betelgeuse battle for control of the house, is an engaging and visually striking set piece that effectively brings the story to a thrilling conclusion. high ( Scene 32 Scene 33 Scene 34 Scene 35 Scene 36 Scene 37 Scene 38 Scene 39 Scene 40 Scene 41 Scene 42 )
- The screenplay successfully blends elements of horror, comedy, and family drama, creating a unique and engaging genre hybrid. high
Engine: Gemini
Recommend
Executive Summary
Beetlejuice is a highly imaginative and entertaining screenplay with a unique blend of comedy, fantasy, and horror. Its strengths lie in its creative premise, well-developed characters, witty dialogue, and visually striking depiction of the afterlife. While there are some areas for improvement, such as further character development and pacing, the overall script is engaging and has the potential to be a successful and memorable film.
- Unique and imaginative premise that blends comedy, fantasy, and horror, creating a distinct and memorable world. high
- Well-developed and quirky characters, especially the Maitlands and Lydia, who are relatable and engaging despite their unusual circumstances. high
- Witty and fast-paced dialogue that keeps the story moving and adds to the comedic tone of the film. high
- Creative and visually striking depiction of the afterlife bureaucracy and the various realms of the afterworld, adding to the film's unique aesthetic. medium ( Scene 15 Scene 17 Scene 34 )
- Exploration of themes like death, grief, family, and acceptance, providing depth and emotional resonance to the story. medium
- Charles Deetz's character arc and motivations could be further explored, particularly his sudden shift towards exploiting the ghosts for financial gain. medium ( Scene 21 Scene 38 Scene 39 )
- Betelgeuse's character, while entertaining, could be toned down slightly in certain scenes to maintain a balance between humor and creepiness. low ( Scene 27 Scene 41 )
- The pacing in the middle section could be tightened to maintain momentum and prevent the story from dragging. low
- Further exploration of the rules and limitations of the afterlife, especially regarding the interaction between ghosts and the living, could add depth and clarity to the world-building. medium
- The film's ending leaves room for potential sequels or further exploration of the characters and their lives in the afterlife. medium
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.25, The screenplay's premise effectively sets up an intriguing and somewhat unique narrative. It establishes a clear conflict and introduces compelling characters, but it could benefit from further development to fully captivate the audience. By enhancing the originality of the premise and clarifying certain aspects, the screenplay can create a stronger hook and increase its overall appeal. See More
Structure: 8.5, The screenplay has a well-structured plot with an engaging balance of tension and release. It effectively builds tension through the use of supernatural and comedic elements, keeping the audience engaged and entertained. See More
Theme: 8.25, The screenplay effectively explores the themes of death, the afterlife, and the importance of human connection. The themes are woven into the narrative in a way that is both natural and engaging, and they provide a depth and resonance to the story. However, some aspects of the themes could be further developed to enhance their impact on the audience. See More
Visual Impact: 8.25, This screenplay showcases creative and engaging visual language to support its storytelling. The vivid descriptions and unique visual elements capture the essence of the narrative and create a memorable and immersive experience for the reader. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.5, The screenplay exhibits strength in evoking emotions through its endearing characters, humorous moments, and surreal portrayal of the afterlife. However, there's potential to enhance the emotional depth by exploring the characters' inner conflicts and motivations in greater detail and prolonging the emotional payoff of key scenes. See More
Conflict: 7.75, The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes, providing a solid foundation for tension and audience engagement. While the central conflict is clear and compelling, the stakes could be further elevated and integrated more deeply with the narrative to enhance their impact and drive the story forward. Additionally, the resolution of the conflicts could be more satisfying and appropriate, leaving room for improvement in providing a rewarding conclusion. See More
Originality: 8.5, This screenplay showcases captivating originality and creativity in its imaginative blend of the supernatural and dark comedy genres. The story takes viewers on a thrilling adventure filled with eccentric characters and unexpected twists, making for a unique and engaging cinematic experience. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- Adam Maitland, a model townmaker, finishes his miniature Winter River creation and places a daddy longlegs spider in it, while his wife Barbara enters the attic with a present for him. They exchange gifts, express their excitement for their upcoming vacation, and share a few jokes. However, their peaceful moment is interrupted by the forgotten vacation voicemail message and a car honking outside. Barbara goes downstairs to answer the door, leaving Adam alone in the attic, smiling at his model town. The scene takes place during the day in the Maitland attic, filled with warm light and visual elements such as the miniature model and gifts.
- Adam and Barbara Maitland continue down the main staircase of their old-fashioned house. Barbara goes to the kitchen while Adam continues to the basement. A real estate agent named Jane Butterfield arrives and tries to convince Barbara to sell the house for 350,000 dollars. Barbara refuses, and Adam listens to an Inkspots love song in the ground floor storeroom. Jane's offer creates a conflict, as Barbara wants to keep the house while Jane thinks it's too big for them. The scene ends with Barbara shutting the door on Jane and Adam listening to the Inkspots love song.
- In the Maitland house, Barbara gets frustrated with the Inkspots music while papering the guest room walls. Jane's fixation on the window startles Adam in the storage room. To get a brush and a piece of the model, Adam asks Barbara to join him for a store run. They drive off in the car, singing an old Johnny Mathis song, leaving behind the daytime setting of the house, storage room, and rickety bridge.
- The scene opens with the Maitlands driving by the Bozman Building and waving at a brass lion outside. Inside, Jane Butterfield's daughter is making copies while Jane discusses a real estate offer on the phone. The setting then shifts to the Maitland Hardware store, where Old Bill, a barber, naps and chats with Adam about his vacation and a model he's building. The tone is light and humorous, with no major conflicts. The scene ends with Old Bill continuing to talk, even after Adam has entered the hardware store.
- Adam and Barbara, a married couple, leave a hardware store with painting supplies for the Bozman building model. As they drive away, they hit a dog, which leads to their car swerving off a bridge and crashing into a river, injuring Barbara's arm. Upon returning home, a fire inexplicably starts, and Barbara's injured arm catches fire, adding to the mysterious and unsettling atmosphere.
- In the living room of their house, Adam and Barbara have a tense conversation about the crash. Adam, looking pale and possibly injured, tells Barbara that he doesn't think they survived. She dismisses his concerns, but he decides to go outside and retrace their steps. As he disappears into a void, giant gears appear and nearly crush him, but he is jerked to safety. The scene ends with Adam's panicked calls for Barbara from within the void.
- Barbara and Adam, now realizing they might be deceased, discover a handbook for the recently deceased. Their fear and uncertainty grow as they observe their own funeral procession in the distance, including Jane's car. The main conflict lies in Barbara's fear of not being in control and her worry about being stuck in their current state. Adam suggests setting up a normal routine to help them cope. The scene takes place at night, starting on the front porch and moving into the living room, bedroom, and finally at a window overlooking a distant cemetery. Key pieces of dialogue include Barbara mentioning her discoveries and Adam reading from the handbook, discussing their fears and concerns about their current situation.
- In their afterlife, Adam and Barbara Maitland struggle to accept their new existence as they observe the living Delia, Lydia Deetz, and Otho plan to renovate their cherished home. The Maitlands, invisible to the living, cannot express their concerns as they come to terms with their death and the changes in their home.
- Barbara and Adam, the ghostly residents of the Maitland home, discuss their new reality in the upstairs hallway. Meanwhile, interior designers Otho and Delia enter to discuss their redecorating plans, oblivious to the supernatural presence. The ghosts disappear and reappear in Lydia's future room, where Delia's favorite color, viridian, is discussed. Otho discovers the Maitlands' wedding outfits in the closet, and Delia accidentally slams the door on Barbara's face. The scene takes a dark turn when the ghosts' corpses are revealed in the closet, with Barbara's face torn off. The scene ends with Otho's exclamation about the size of the other closets.
- Delia and Otho explore Lydia's house and discover Adam's headless corpse in Charles' study, which upsets Barbara. After the headless corpse reattaches its head, Adam and Barbara argue about scaring people as ghosts. Barbara storms out of the room and disappears, reappearing on Saturn's moon Titan and getting chased by a giant sandworm. The scene is filled with eerie tension, shocking moments, and some humor.
- In the kitchen, Barbara Maitland expresses her fear of being alone to her son Adam, who brings up her abandoning him. They apologize and empathize with each other's situation. In the dining room, the Deetzes have a tense dinner where Lydia expresses her frustration and teenage angst, and Delia dismisses it, talking about their plans for the house. The scene ends with Lydia looking at her parents with sadness and anger, and Barbara and Adam listening outside the door with tears in their eyes.
- Adam and Barbara, now ghosts, come across a handbill for a bio-exorcist named Betelgeuse while observing the chaos of moving crews in their front yard from the attic. Charles is frustrated by a range being delivered through his kitchen window, while Delia berates workers outside. Lydia notices Adam and Barbara in the attic window and interacts with Jane, who gives Lydia a skeleton key to the house. The scene ends with Lydia following Delia's shrieking and dropping the key into her pocket.
- Lydia finds her mother, Delia, in distress and pinned by a sculpture. After helping Delia, Lydia heads to the attic to retrieve aspirin, where she encounters a locked door. Inside the attic, Adam and Barbara, now ghosts, are taken aback by Lydia's attempts to enter. On an old TV, a disguised Betelgeuse appears, singing and urging someone to 'come on down'. The scene ends with Adam and Barbara in shock as they stare at each other, confused by Betelgeuse's unexpected appearance.
- In the landing, Lydia attempts to open a door with a skeleton key, but it's stuck. Charles appears, scares her, and takes the key, dismissing her desire for connection. In the attic, Adam and Barbara find a handbook and successfully open a chalk door they draw on the chimney. Lydia comes down to tell Charles about a bird she saw, but he brushes her off and becomes fixated on the Bozman building. Excited, Adam and Barbara enter a mysterious world through the chalk door. The scene is tense and eerie, with a sense of mystery and excitement.
- In a run-down, unpleasant waiting room filled with dead people, Adam and Barbara meet a bitter and unhelpful 50's styled receptionist. They learn that they need an appointment with their caseworker, Juno, and will have to wait for three hours. The receptionist explains the rule of three and the concept of D-90 intercessions. With no resolution in sight, they quietly hold hands as they wait for their turn to see Juno.
- In the attic, Lydia finds a handbook with instructions to a chalk door. Meanwhile, Barbara and Adam discuss death's enigmatic nature with the Receptionist, who shares her own experience. A messenger corpse delivers a message for Maitland, party of two, to proceed to the sixth door. However, Barbara and Adam have forgotten their handbook, leaving their next steps uncertain.
- Lydia is called away from her studies to assist Delia, while Adam and Barbara traverse a disturbing landscape of skeletons, mist-filled human soup, and a lost souls room. They encounter various characters, including a helpful Messenger and a Sinister Little Janitor. The group faces conflicts, tension, and confusion as they press on, ultimately reaching the sixth door and preparing to enter.
- In this somber and melancholic scene, Adam and Barbara return as ghosts to their newly furnished and decorated home, only to find it occupied by new people. They encounter their caseworker, Juno, who informs them that they have been dead for three months. In their dismay, they request Juno's help in getting rid of the new occupants, but she declines, stating her role and their unfortunate situation. The scene ends with Juno's revelation, leaving the conflict unresolved. The key visual elements include the unfamiliar furniture, and Juno's slashed throat, with occasional puffs of smoke. The key dialogue revolves around their realization of being home, Juno's revelation, and their request for help.
- In this humorous and lighthearted scene, ghost Juno finds Adam and Barbara struggling to haunt their house. Offering advice, Juno instructs them to use their talents and practice, warning against seeking help from Betelgeuse. The scene takes place in the attic, where Juno examines Delia's sculpture. The scene concludes with Juno departing for the midwest to assist football players.
- Juno, a ghost, reveals to Adam and Barbara that a troublemaking assistant of hers, now a demoted malevolent spirit, has been imprisoned in their cemetery after the Chicago Fire. Juno warns them to remove the Deetz's themselves and fades away. The scene ends with a fly being lured into the model cemetery and then pulled into a grave with the name Betelgeuse engraved on it, followed by a clap of thunder. Adam and Barbara decide to handle the situation confidently despite the eerie and ominous tone.
- In this scene, Charles tries to persuade Maxie Dean, a wealthy businessman, to invest in buying the whole town of Winter River, Connecticut. The conversation is filled with Charles emphasizing his ability to make Maxie money and his plans for Winter River, while Maxie expresses his reservations about the location and his busy schedule. A low moaning sound in the corridor distracts Charles during the conversation. However, Maxie remains uninterested and ends the call after setting up a potential future visit. The scene ends with Maxie shaking his head, calling Charles a 'putz' and dismissing the idea of investing in Winter River.
- In this lighthearted and humorous scene, Charles gets startled by a ghost in his study, which turns out to be a prank by his daughter Lydia. Adam and Barbara, actual ghosts, attempt to scare Delia but fail. Lydia takes a picture of them, revealing their ghostly nature. The scene ends with a standoff between Lydia and the ghosts as they try to communicate.
- In the upstairs hallway at night, Adam and Barbara, covered in sheets, are confronted by Lydia who reveals she's not scared as she thought they were just Ralph Lauren sheets. Lydia shows off her intelligence and sass, while Barbara responds with kindness and understanding. Adam remains cautious and defensive. Lydia shares her knowledge of the 'Handbook for the Recently Deceased' and admits to stealing the attic key, creating a light-hearted yet mysterious atmosphere. The scene concludes with Barbara proposing they have a conversation, indicating potential for further understanding in future scenes.
- In the attic, Adam and Barbara, the ghosts of the previous homeowners, reveal to Lydia, the new resident, their plan to scare away the newcomers. Lydia, fascinated by the ghosts and the attic transformed into their old hometown, inquires about their funeral. Despite the ghosts' intentions, Lydia wishes to visit again, leading to a conflict that remains unresolved as she is called away by her father.
- A tense scene unfolds in the house as Delia confronts Lydia about damaged sheets, which leads to a heated exchange. Lydia, seeking validation, shows Charles a ghostly image in one of her photos, but he dismisses it as a prank. Despite Lydia's desperation, Charles sends her on an errand to photograph buildings around town. The scene takes place in various locations of the house, with the visual elements including a big machine causing disturbance in the yard, Lydia working on Polaroid enlargements in the basement, Delia holding the eye-holed sheets, and Charles examining a plat map of Winter River in the attic. The conflicts remain unresolved, and the overall mood is eerie due to the ghostly image and the mention of ghosts living in the house.
- In the kitchen and attic room of Delia's house, Delia is anxious about her dinner party and annoyed with Lydia's ghost photographs. Meanwhile, Adam and Barbara discuss using Lydia's photos to contact Betelgeuse and eventually find his gravestone in the model cemetery. After saying his name three times, they are transported to the graveyard, ending the scene in a mysterious and intriguing manner.
- Adam and Barbara Maitland, the ghostly residents of a haunted house, discover the grave of the home's previous owner, Betelgeuse, and accidentally bring him back to life as a mouldering corpse marionette. Betelgeuse agrees to help the Maitlands scare away the new residents, the Deetzes, in exchange for a fee, but the Maitlands soon realize he is a dangerous and unpredictable character. After changing their minds about working with him, the Maitlands disappear, leaving Betelgeuse enraged.
- In the attic, Adam and Barbara plan to scare off the supernatural being Betelgeuse, while in the dining room, the Deetzes' dinner party is filled with tension and bickering guests. Lydia reveals she has seen ghosts, causing a stir among the guests, and Otho directs his attacks towards Beryl. The scene ends with the guests' continued arguing and Lydia's revelation.
- Delia and Charles prepare for a dinner party while discussing sending their daughter Lydia to boarding school. Tensions rise until Delia forcefully sings an Ink Spots song in a deep voice, causing the other guests to join in and perform Motown choreography. The scene takes a surreal turn when a shrimp from Bernard's cocktail comes to life and punches the guests, causing them to flee the room.
- Adam and Barbara, excited about their successful ghost act, watch from the attic for the guests' reactions which are arguments about the authenticity of the ghosts. Lydia invites them to choose any sheets while Bernard, Delia's agent, is convinced it was a hoax. The scene ends with Bernard leaving the house with Grace and Beryl, convinced it was a sham.
- Delia, Charles, Otho, and Lydia enter the attic and discover a model of their town, along with two ghosts outside the window. Delia demands the ghosts come out, causing them to flee. A conflict arises between Delia and Lydia, as Delia wants to assert her authority over the ghosts and Lydia wants to respect their wishes. The scene takes place during the day and the tone is tense and confrontational.
- Barbara and Adam struggle to hold on outside a house's window ledge over the Inferno, surrounded by devilish monsters. Inside, Delia, Charles, and Otho discuss using the ghosts for their benefit while Lydia is uncooperative. A snake attacks them, causing fear, but Barbara shouts 'Betelgeuse', turning the snake back into a handrail and making Betelgeuse disappear.
- Adam and Barbara, feeling exhausted and agitated, discuss their situation in the attic. The intruder, Betelgeuse, who has been turned into a small spirit and is trapped in a model of the town, is angry about it. He has run a pickup into a fire hydrant and is hopping mad. When Barbara stops him from causing more damage, he threatens Lydia. In response, Barbara picks him up and squeezes him, causing him to grow spikes that pierce her skin. She releases him and he plummets, with the scene ending in tension.
- In this tense and chaotic scene, Betelgeuse enters a whorehouse in a model town's common, while Barbara and Adam are shocked and confused. Meanwhile, Juno expresses her anger towards Barbara and Adam for allowing Betelgeuse to roam freely, causing chaos. The conflict is not resolved as Juno leaves the room to deal with a group of football players. The scene ends with Juno intending to return and discuss the matter further with Barbara and Adam.
- In this tense and dramatic scene, Charles and Delia discuss their supernatural problems and the need for Otho's help in producing ghosts for Max and Sarah. Meanwhile, Lydia writes a suicide note and goes to the attic to find the Maitlands, but instead encounters Betelgeuse. Betelgeuse tries to convince Lydia to free him, but she refuses and insists on talking to Barbara. The scene ends with Lydia still determined to communicate with the Maitlands and Betelgeuse unable to be released.
- In Juno's office, Juno instructs Adam and Barbara to exorcise Betelgeuse and Otho from the house, but they are reluctant and attempt to scare her instead. Juno sends them to clean house and gather photographs and a handbook. Meanwhile, Lydia enters the scene, and Barbara rushes up to the attic to be with her, leaving the exorcism unfinished. The scene is eerie and tense, with moments of humor, and ends with Barbara's escape to the attic.
- In the attic, Lydia is stopped from summoning Betelgeuse with her mother's help by Adam/Monster. Betelgeuse falls into thorny bushes, causing Lydia to run out of the attic in terror and be caught by Barbara/Monster. Barbara consoles Lydia, who expresses her desire to be dead, while Adam is confused and frustrated. Otho and Charles enter, steal the model, and leave Lydia to run after them. The scene is emotionally tense and ends with the theft of the model.
- Lydia bursts into a dining room where a presentation about a ghost town museum and other projects is being held by Charles and other investors. She reveals that the ghosts are no longer present, but the investors demand to see them. Otho, a self-proclaimed professional, offers to summon the ghosts with something personal of theirs. Lydia is hesitant, but the other investors are eager. The scene ends with Otho saying he can summon the ghosts and Lydia becoming hesitant.
- In the attic, Barbara proposes teaching Lydia to sew, while Adam remains skeptical. In the dining room, Delia prepares Barbara's wedding dress and Adam's tuxedo, and Otho holds up a handbook. In the living room, Otho conducts a seance, causing a sizzle and tiny crackle on the square. In the attic, Barbara vanishes, leaving Adam bewildered and distressed. The scene is filled with emotional tension, conflicts, and a sense of foreboding, with significant visual elements including the wedding dress, tuxedo, and Barbara's disappearance.
- In the dining room at night, varicolored lightning bolts fill the room as Barbara's wedding dress floats over the table, filling with her aging body. Lydia shows concern and pleads with the model for help, while Adam also appears, older and puzzled. The other guests are delighted. Otho admits to not knowing what is happening. The conflict of Lydia's desperation to save Barbara and Adam is not resolved, and the scene ends with Lydia weeping and pleading with the model for help.
- In the model town graveyard at night, Betelgeuse summons a carnival-like setting and attacks the Maitlands' friends and family to force Lydia to marry him. The Maitlands try to intervene, but Betelgeuse grows too powerful. In the end, Barbara rides a sand worm to the house and feeds Betelgeuse to it, putting an end to his menacing presence.
- The scene opens on Main Street of Winter River, where Ernie polishes a lion statue and Lydia meets Jane Butterfield. Lydia reminds Ernie to polish the balls of the lion statue, and Jane gets frustrated during a phone call. The conversation over the phone reveals that Jane is trying to sell the Maitland house, but Delia and Charles refuse to sell it. The scene ends with Lydia levitating and singing, and the camera showing the dilapidated Maitland house in contrast to a perfect New England house model.
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Character Lydia Deetz
Description Lydia initially reacts with fear and disgust towards the Maitlands' ghostly forms but quickly shifts to curiosity and even admiration. This change seems abrupt and lacks a clear transition or explanation.
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Character Delia Deetz
Description Delia's attitude towards the ghosts fluctuates. Initially, she dismisses their existence but later becomes desperate to prove their presence to her guests, suggesting a sudden shift in her beliefs and motivations.
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Description The concept of 'help vouchers' and the limitation of three interventions with Juno is introduced without any prior explanation or foreshadowing, making it feel like an arbitrary rule.
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Description Betelgeuse's ability to interact with the physical world and cause chaos within the model town is inconsistent with the established rules of the afterlife and the limitations placed on ghosts.
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Description Betelgeuse's dialogue, while eccentric, often feels overly cartoonish and out of place with the more grounded tone of the other characters.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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Adam Maitland | Adam Maitland starts off as a solid and easy-going citizen deeply attached to his home, but after his transition into the afterlife, he begins to feel the limitations of his existence. As he adapts to being a ghost, he shows determination, curiosity, and resilience in understanding his new reality. Throughout the feature, Adam's bond with Barbara grows stronger, and he learns to cope with challenges by using humor and optimism to lighten the mood. By the end of the screenplay, Adam has embraced his new existence and found a sense of peace and purpose in helping others transition to the afterlife. | The character arc for Adam Maitland is well-developed, showing growth, resilience, and emotional depth. However, there could be more exploration of Adam's internal struggles and conflicts as he navigates his new reality as a ghost. Additionally, more emphasis on his relationship with Barbara and how it evolves throughout the feature could add depth to his character arc. | To improve the character arc for Adam Maitland, consider adding more internal conflicts and emotional struggles as he adjusts to being a ghost. Explore his fears, doubts, and uncertainties about his new existence, as well as his evolving relationship with Barbara. Show more moments of vulnerability and growth for Adam, highlighting his resilience and determination in the face of challenges. This will add depth and complexity to his character arc, making it more engaging and compelling for the audience. |
Barbara Maitland | Barbara Maitland's character arc in the screenplay follows her journey from a childless woman longing for human connection to a strong and determined ghost who adapts to her afterlife and finds comfort in her emotional connection with Adam. Throughout the story, Barbara learns to overcome her fears and frustrations, embracing her vulnerability and resilience to ultimately find peace and acceptance in her new existence. | The character arc for Barbara Maitland is well-developed and allows for significant growth and transformation. However, there could be more clarity in her emotional journey and the specific events that lead to her evolution. Additionally, the transitions between her different emotional states could be smoother to enhance the audience's understanding of her character development. | To improve Barbara Maitland's character arc, consider adding more specific moments or conflicts that trigger her emotional shifts and growth. Develop key scenes that highlight her inner struggles and desires, showing her gradual transformation from a vulnerable ghost to a strong and determined woman. Focus on creating seamless transitions between her different emotional states to enhance the audience's emotional connection with her character. |
Adam | Adam starts off as a practical and skeptical character focused on retrieving his model, but as he interacts with the living and the supernatural events unfold, he shows a softer side and becomes more protective and caring towards his wife Barbara and Lydia. Throughout the screenplay, Adam's character arc involves him balancing his sense of duty as a ghost with his growing attachment to Lydia, ultimately leading to a decision that showcases his loyalty and determination to do what is right for his family. | The character arc for Adam is well-developed and engaging, showcasing his growth and internal conflict as he navigates the challenges of the afterlife. However, there could be more clarity in his emotional journey and the resolution of his internal conflict. Additionally, there could be more opportunities for Adam to showcase his vulnerability and depth of character, especially in relation to his relationships with Barbara and Lydia. | To improve the character arc for Adam, consider adding more scenes that delve into his emotional journey and internal conflict, highlighting his vulnerability and depth of character. Provide moments of introspection and reflection for Adam to showcase his growth and development throughout the screenplay. Additionally, explore his relationships with Barbara and Lydia in more depth, allowing for more nuanced interactions and emotional stakes for Adam. |
Barbara | Barbara starts off as a strong-willed and independent woman who is protective of her home and family. As the story progresses, she faces supernatural challenges that test her resilience and determination. Through her interactions with the living and the afterlife, Barbara learns to embrace her vulnerability and seek emotional connections. She ultimately finds peace and closure by letting go of her attachment to material things and focusing on nurturing her relationships with Adam and Lydia. | The character arc for Barbara is well-developed, showcasing her growth from a protective and independent ghost to a compassionate and nurturing figure. However, there could be more clarity in her internal struggles and emotional journey throughout the screenplay. The transitions in her character development could be smoother to enhance the audience's connection with Barbara's transformation. | To improve the character arc for Barbara, consider incorporating more internal monologues or reflective moments that delve into her emotional turmoil and growth. Show more instances of her grappling with her fears and vulnerabilities, leading to pivotal moments of self-discovery and acceptance. Strengthen the connections between her past experiences and present actions to create a more cohesive and impactful character arc. |
Jane Butterfield | Jane Butterfield starts off as a persistent and opportunistic real estate agent focused solely on making sales. However, as she interacts with the Maitlands and witnesses the impact of her actions on their lives, she begins to question her ruthless approach. Throughout the screenplay, Jane undergoes a transformation, realizing the importance of empathy and compassion in her profession. By the end of the feature, Jane learns to balance her assertive nature with a newfound sensitivity towards others, ultimately becoming a more well-rounded and likable character. | The character arc for Jane Butterfield is well-developed and provides a satisfying journey for the audience. However, to enhance the emotional impact of her transformation, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into Jane's backstory and motivations. Exploring the reasons behind her aggressive demeanor and showcasing moments of vulnerability could help the audience connect with her on a deeper level. | To improve the character arc for Jane Butterfield, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that reveal her past experiences and how they have shaped her personality. Additionally, provide moments of internal conflict for Jane as she grapples with her ruthless nature and the consequences of her actions. This will add depth to her character and make her transformation more compelling for the audience. |
Otho | Otho starts off as a flamboyant and eccentric character who is knowledgeable in interior design and the supernatural. As the story progresses, his pretentious and self-absorbed nature becomes more prominent, leading to conflicts with other characters. However, through his interactions with the ghosts and the challenges he faces, Otho begins to realize the importance of humility and teamwork. By the end of the screenplay, Otho learns to appreciate the value of genuine connections and uses his expertise for the greater good. | The character arc for Otho is well-developed, showing a clear progression from his flamboyant and eccentric persona to a more humble and team-oriented individual. However, there could be more depth added to his insecurities and vulnerabilities to make his transformation more impactful. Additionally, Otho's interactions with other characters could be further explored to showcase his growth and development throughout the screenplay. | To improve the character arc for Otho, consider delving deeper into his insecurities and vulnerabilities, perhaps through flashbacks or internal monologues. Show more instances of Otho facing challenges that force him to confront his flaws and learn from his mistakes. Additionally, focus on developing his relationships with other characters to highlight his growth and transformation more effectively. |
Betelgeuse | Betelgeuse starts off as a mysterious and potentially dangerous figure, hinted at through the grave in the model cemetery. As the story progresses, his true malevolent nature is revealed as he manipulates and causes chaos in the town. However, towards the climax, Betelgeuse's plans begin to unravel as the protagonists outsmart him, leading to his ultimate defeat and imprisonment once again. | The character arc for Betelgeuse is well-developed, showcasing his malevolent nature and cunning personality. However, to enhance the arc, there could be more exploration of his motivations and backstory to provide a deeper understanding of why he is the way he is. Additionally, adding moments of vulnerability or redemption could add complexity to his character and make his ultimate defeat more impactful. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating flashbacks or dialogue that delves into Betelgeuse's past and motivations. This can help humanize him and make his actions more understandable to the audience. Additionally, adding moments of vulnerability or redemption can create a more dynamic and multi-dimensional character. Finally, ensure that Betelgeuse's defeat is satisfying and well-earned, with the protagonists using their wits and strengths to outsmart him in a clever and unexpected way. |
Charles | Charles starts off as a practical and ambitious businessman who sees the supernatural events as a potential business opportunity. As the story progresses, he becomes more aware of the dangers around him and begins to question his priorities of profit and control. Through his interactions with other characters, particularly Delia, he learns the importance of empathy and cooperation. By the end of the screenplay, Charles undergoes a transformation, becoming more open-minded and willing to embrace the unknown. | The character arc for Charles is well-developed and provides a clear progression for his growth throughout the story. However, there could be more depth added to his internal struggles and conflicts as he navigates the supernatural events. Additionally, his transformation could be more impactful if there were specific moments or interactions that trigger his change in perspective. | To improve the character arc for Charles, consider adding more internal monologues or moments of reflection where he grapples with his beliefs and values. Show more instances where he is directly challenged by the supernatural events, forcing him to confront his priorities. Additionally, create more meaningful interactions between Charles and other characters that highlight his growth and development, leading to a more impactful transformation by the end of the screenplay. |
Lydia | Lydia starts off as a rebellious teenager seeking to assert her identity and find her place in the world. As she discovers the supernatural elements in the house, she transitions into a brave and curious young girl who confronts the ghosts with courage. Throughout the story, Lydia struggles with fear, uncertainty, and family dynamics, but ultimately shows resilience, determination, and a desire for connection with the supernatural beings. By the end of the screenplay, Lydia has grown emotionally and intellectually, finding acceptance and understanding in the mysteries around her. | The character arc for Lydia is well-developed, showcasing her growth and transformation throughout the story. However, there could be more emphasis on her internal struggles and emotional depth to further enhance her complexity as a character. Additionally, providing more clarity on her motivations and desires could help the audience connect with Lydia on a deeper level. | To improve the character arc for Lydia, consider incorporating more moments of vulnerability and introspection to highlight her internal conflicts and emotional journey. Showcasing her relationships with other characters, especially the ghosts, can also add depth to her development. Additionally, exploring Lydia's backstory and motivations in greater detail can help the audience understand her actions and decisions more effectively. |
Juno | Juno starts off as a strict and mysterious figure, guiding Adam and Barbara with warnings and advice. As the story progresses, her past mistakes and experiences in the afterlife are revealed, showing a more vulnerable and human side to her character. Through her interactions with the Maitlands, Juno learns to let go of her rigid facade and embrace her own vulnerabilities, ultimately finding redemption and closure. | The character arc for Juno is well-developed and adds depth to her character. However, there could be more opportunities to explore her backstory and motivations further, allowing the audience to connect with her on a deeper level. Additionally, the resolution of her arc could be more impactful and emotionally resonant, providing a more satisfying conclusion to her journey. | To improve the character arc for Juno, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that delve into her past experiences and mistakes, shedding light on her motivations and inner struggles. This will help the audience empathize with her character and understand her actions better. Additionally, focus on building stronger emotional connections between Juno and the Maitlands, leading to a more poignant resolution that highlights her growth and redemption. |
Delia | Delia starts off as a dismissive and skeptical character towards the supernatural, but as the story progresses, she becomes more open-minded and accepting of the ghosts' presence. Through her interactions with the supernatural, Delia learns to let go of her need for control and embrace the unknown, ultimately finding a new sense of creativity and inspiration in her art. | The character arc for Delia is well-developed and allows for growth and change throughout the story. However, to enhance the arc further, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into Delia's backstory and motivations. Exploring her past experiences and how they have shaped her beliefs and behaviors could add more depth to her character development. | To improve the character arc for Delia, consider incorporating flashback scenes or dialogue that provide insight into her past. This could help the audience understand why Delia is so focused on her social status and reputation, as well as her initial skepticism towards the supernatural. Additionally, showing more vulnerability and emotional depth in Delia's interactions with the ghosts could make her character arc more impactful and relatable to the audience. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Ghosts and Afterlife | Adam and Barbara Maitland become ghosts, they discover a handbook for the recently deceased, encounter their caseworker Juno, and try to scare away the new residents of their house. They also meet Betelgeuse, a troublemaking assistant of Juno's who has been imprisoned in their cemetery. | The screenplay explores the concept of the afterlife and what happens when we die. It deals with the idea of being trapped in a place and trying to find a way to move on. | ||||||||||||
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Home and Belonging | Adam and Barbara Maitland are trying to protect their home from the new residents, the Deetzes. They want to scare them away so they can have their home back. Lydia, the Deetzes' daughter, also feels like she doesn't belong and finds comfort in the ghosts' company. | The screenplay explores the idea of home and belonging, and what happens when we are forced to leave our home or share it with others. It also deals with the idea of acceptance and finding a place where we feel comfortable. | ||||||||||||
Family and Relationships | The Maitlands have a strong relationship and are trying to protect their home together. Lydia, the Deetzes' daughter, has a difficult relationship with her parents and finds comfort in the ghosts' company. The Deetzes are also trying to find their place in the new town and in their new home. | The screenplay explores the idea of family and relationships, and how they can be both a source of comfort and a source of conflict. It deals with the idea of communication and understanding, and how important they are in maintaining healthy relationships. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goal in the screenplay is to come to terms with their new existence as ghosts and navigate the challenges they face in the afterlife. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goal in the screenplay is to navigate the strange and potentially dangerous situation they find themselves in with the Deetzes. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay revolves around the clash between the living and the dead, as well as the concept of acceptance and adaptation to change. |
Character Development Contribution: The goals and conflicts contribute to the character's development by forcing them to confront their fears, navigate their new reality, and find a sense of purpose and belonging in their afterlife.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The goals and conflicts drive the narrative forward by creating tension, conflict, and resolution as the characters face challenges, make choices, and evolve throughout the story.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of life, death, acceptance, adaptation, and the supernatural, delving into the complexities of existence and the afterlife.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Preparing for Vacation with a Touch of Model-Making | Whimsical, Heartwarming, Playful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - The Maitlands' Morning: A Real Estate Offer and a Refusal | Humorous, Warm, Sentimental | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - Papering the Walls and a Rickety Bridge Ride | Light-hearted, Whimsical, Romantic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
4 - A Quiet Morning in Winter River: The Maitlands, Jane Butterfield, and Old Bill | Humorous, Quirky, Light-hearted | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
5 - An Accident and an Unexplained Fire: A Perilous Afternoon for Adam and Barbara | Whimsical, Surreal, Tragic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Adam's Disappearance and the Approaching Gears | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Eerie, Intriguing | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Realization of the Afterlife | Somber, Reflective, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Ghostly Beginnings: The Maitlands and the Arrival of the Deetz Family | Humorous, Whimsical, Sarcastic, Surreal | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Ghostly Encounter in the Maitland Home | Dark, Humorous, Suspenseful | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - Ghostly Encounter and Interdimensional Chase | Dark, Humorous, Suspenseful | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Fear, Frustration, and Family Tension in the Maitland House | Humorous, Melancholic, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Discovering Betelgeuse | Whimsical, Dark, Satirical | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
13 - Lydia's Attic Investigation and Betelgeuse's TV Appearance | Whimsical, Dark, Humorous | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
14 - The Stuck Door and the Chalk Door | Whimsical, Suspenseful, Darkly comedic | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Unhelpful Receptionist and a Three Hour Wait in the Afterlife | Dark, Sarcastic, Satirical | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Discovering the Chalk Door and Pondering Death's Mysteries | Whimsical, Dark, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Navigating the Otherworldly Office: A Search for Delia | Sad, Mysterious, Dark, Humorous | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Ghostly Dilemma: The Unwelcome New Occupants | Whimsical, Dark, Sarcastic | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Juno's Haunting Lessons | Whimsical, Dark, Sarcastic | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
20 - Juno Warns of Malevolent Spirit in Cemetery | Dark, Humorous, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
21 - Charles' Failed Attempt to Convince Maxie to Invest in Winter River | Persuasive, Relaxed, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
22 - Prankster Lydia and the Ghostly Standoff | Humorous, Whimsical, Spooky | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Ghostly Encounter: Lydia Meets Adam and Barbara | Whimsical, Sarcastic, Playful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - A Fascinating Encounter in the Attic | Whimsical, Playful, Inquisitive | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Confrontations and Dismissals: The Ghostly Image and Damaged Sheets | Humorous, Mysterious, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Delia's Dinner Party and a Journey to the Graveyard | Humorous, Eerie, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - The Maitlands' Unwise Bargain with Betelgeuse | Humorous, Sarcastic, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Handling the Supernatural and a Tense Dinner Party | Humorous, Sarcastic, Sardonic, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
29 - Surreal Dinner Party Disrupted by Singing and a Living Shrimp | Humorous, Whimsical, Surreal | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Chaos and Skepticism as Ghosts Fail to Reappear | Humorous, Whimsical, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Confrontation in the Attic | Humorous, Suspenseful, Whimsical | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Betelgeuse Saves the Day | Humorous, Suspenseful, Fantastical | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - Confrontation in the Attic: Barbara vs Betelgeuse | Humorous, Dark, Sarcastic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - Betelgeuse Wreaks Havoc, Juno's Anger Erupts, and Football Players Interrupt | Humorous, Surreal, Farcical | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - Lydia's Search for the Maitlands and Betelgeuse's Attempted Release | Humorous, Sinister, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - Juno's Instructions and Barbara's Escape | Tense, Emotional, Humorous | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Lydia's Desire to Be Dead and the Theft of the Model | Humorous, Heartfelt, Suspenseful | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
38 - Lydia Interrupts a Ghost Town Museum Presentation with a Revelation | Humorous, Suspenseful, Whimsical | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - A Night of Uncertainty and Disappearance | Whimsical, Melancholic, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | |
40 - Supernatural Wedding Dress and Desperate Pleas | Tense, Emotional, Surreal, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
41 - Betelgeuse's Carnival of Terror and His Ultimate Demise | Dark, Humorous, Surreal, Menacing | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Lydia's Arrival and the Maitland House Dilemma | Whimsical, Dark, Surreal, Satirical | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Innovative concept
- Engaging plot twists
- Well-developed characters
- Witty dialogue
- Emotional depth
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development
- Low emotional impact
- Some elements may be confusing for the audience
- Some dialogue could be more impactful
- Some tonal shifts may be jarring for the audience
Suggestions
- Focus on character development to enhance emotional impact
- Refine dialogue to make it more engaging and impactful
- Ensure clarity in the interactions between characters and elements of the story
- Consider the overall tone of the screenplay and eliminate any jarring tonal shifts
- Revise plot points to avoid predictability
- Physical environment: The screenplay takes place in a picturesque New England town with Victorian houses, a rickety bridge, a church, a graveyard, and a model town in an attic. The environment is quaint and idyllic, yet has a surreal and dreamlike quality in some scenes. The physical environment shapes the characters' experiences by creating a sense of nostalgia, mystery, and otherworldliness.
- Culture: The cultural elements in the screenplay include small-town gossip, hardware stores, antique shops, and a mix of old and new technology. The culture is a blend of tradition and modernity, with a strong sense of community. The cultural elements contribute to the narrative by providing a backdrop for the characters' interactions and relationships.
- Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is depicted as a mix of familial and professional relationships. The interactions between the characters showcase a range of dynamics, from friendly to adversarial. The societal structures contribute to the narrative by creating conflicts and resolutions between the characters.
- Technology: The technological elements in the screenplay are minimal, with a few mentions of phones, typewriters, and a self-serve Xerox machine. The technology is used primarily for communication and documentation. The technological elements contribute to the narrative by providing a sense of realism and modernity in contrast to the supernatural elements.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions by creating a sense of place, community, and identity. The characters interact with their environment in ways that reveal their personalities, motivations, and conflicts.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by providing a rich and detailed setting for the characters' stories to unfold. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology create a sense of place and atmosphere that enhance the narrative's themes and conflicts.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring themes of nostalgia, community, identity, and the supernatural. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology provide a backdrop for the characters to grapple with these themes and come to terms with their experiences.
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by its whimsical and charming dialogue, detailed narrative descriptions, and focus on domestic scenes and relationships. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a cozy and intimate mood, emphasizing the importance of home and family. |
Best Representation Scene | 1 - Preparing for Vacation with a Touch of Model-Making |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it showcases all of the key elements of the writer's style: the whimsical and charming dialogue, the detailed narrative descriptions, and the focus on domestic scenes and relationships. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Predominance of Humorous Tone | The screenplay has a humorous tone in 24 out of 42 scenes, which is 57% of the total scenes. This pervasive humor might indicate a consistent effort to keep the story light-hearted and entertaining, but it's worth considering if it might overshadow other emotional elements. |
High Scene Grades with Whimsical Tone | Scenes with a whimsical tone have an average overall grade of 8.3, higher than the scene average of 8.0. This suggests that the whimsical elements are well-received and effectively contribute to the story. |
Lower Scene Grades with Serious Tones | Scenes with a serious tone (e.g., somber, sad, mysterious, suspenseful) have an average overall grade of 7.9, lower than the scene average of 8.0. This might indicate that the screenplay struggles to effectively handle more serious moments. |
Character Changes Correlated with Scene Grades | Scenes with character changes have an average overall grade of 7.5, lower than the scene average of 8.0. This could suggest that the character development might be too subtle or not as engaging as other elements of the screenplay. |
High Stakes Scenes with Lower Grades | Scenes with high stakes have an average overall grade of 7.3, lower than the scene average of 8.0. This might indicate that high-stakes situations could be more impactful if they are better integrated with other elements of the screenplay. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay showcases the writer's ability to create engaging and original narratives with a unique blend of genres, humor, and emotional depth. The characters are well-developed, and the dialogue is sharp and witty. However, there is room for improvement in pacing and consistency of tone across scenes.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Save the Cat! by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into crafting engaging scenes, developing compelling characters, and maintaining a consistent tone. Applying these principles can help improve pacing and character motivation in the screenplay. |
Screenplay | The Sixth Sense by M. Night Shyamalan | Studying this screenplay can help the writer understand how to effectively blend supernatural elements with emotional storytelling, while maintaining a consistent tone and clear character motivations. |
Exercise | Practice writing scenes with a focus on character emotions and interactions to deepen the emotional impact of the story.Practice In SceneProv | Improving the writer's ability to create compelling and relatable characters in supernatural settings can help maintain audience engagement and enhance the overall storytelling experience. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Ghost | The main characters, Adam and Barbara Maitland, become ghosts after a car accident. | The Ghost is a common trope in supernatural films and literature where a character dies and becomes a ghost, often stuck in the mortal world and unable to move on to the afterlife. Examples include 'The Sixth Sense' and 'Ghostbusters'. |
The Haunted House | The Maitland's house becomes haunted after they die and become ghosts. | The Haunted House is a classic trope in horror and supernatural films and literature, where a house or building is occupied by supernatural entities, often causing fear and chaos for the living inhabitants. Examples include 'The Amityville Horror' and 'Poltergeist'. |
The Odd Couple | Adam and Barbara Maitland have different personalities and approaches to haunting the Deetzes. | The Odd Couple is a common trope in literature and film where two characters have contrasting personalities and/or lifestyles, often leading to humorous or dramatic situations. Examples include 'The Odd Couple' and 'Fight Club'. |
The Reluctant Hero | Adam Maitland is initially reluctant to embrace his ghostly powers and haunt the Deetzes. | The Reluctant Hero is a common trope in literature and film where a character is called upon to become a hero, often reluctantly and against their will. Examples include 'The Lord of the Rings' and 'Spider-Man'. |
The Meddling Outsider | Jane Butterfield, a real estate agent, tries to convince Barbara Maitland to sell the house. | The Meddling Outsider is a common trope in literature and film where a character from outside the main group tries to interfere or cause problems. Examples include 'The Wizard of Oz' and 'Jaws'. |
The Unwitting Ally | Lydia Deetz, the daughter of the new inhabitants, can see and interact with the ghosts. | The Unwitting Ally is a common trope in literature and film where a character unknowingly helps or supports the main group or character. Examples include 'The Matrix' and 'Star Wars'. |
The Fish Out of Water | The Deetzes, the new inhabitants of the Maitland house, have different lifestyles and personalities than the Maitlands. | The Fish Out of Water is a common trope in literature and film where a character is placed in a new or unfamiliar environment and must adapt. Examples include 'The Lion King' and 'Sleepless in Seattle'. |
The Power of Love | Adam and Barbara Maitland's love for each other and their home helps them overcome their ghostly challenges. | The Power of Love is a common trope in literature and film where love, often romantic, is depicted as a powerful force that can overcome obstacles and challenges. Examples include 'The Notebook' and 'Titanic'. |
The Comic Relief | Betelgeuse, a troublemaking assistant of Juno's, provides comedic relief throughout the film. | The Comic Relief is a common trope in literature and film where a character provides comedic moments or relief in a serious or dramatic situation. Examples include 'The Princess Bride' and 'Guardians of the Galaxy'. |
The Villain's Redemption | Betelgeuse, initially depicted as a villain, is redeemed in the end when he helps the Maitlands and is fed to a sand worm. | The Villain's Redemption is a common trope in literature and film where a villainous character has a change of heart and redeems themselves. Examples include 'The Lion King' and 'Avengers: Endgame'. |
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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13 | Betelgeuse: Say it once... Betelgeuse. Say it twice... Betelgeuse. The third time's a charm... Betelgeuse! Come on down! |
18 | Juno: You're dead. |
8 | Delia: That was the single most unattractive window treatment I have ever seen in the entire of my existence. |
35 | Betelgeuse: You just have to say it! |
19 | Juno: Haunted houses don't come easy. |
Some Loglines to consider:
When a young goth girl, Lydia, befriends the ghosts of her home's previous owners, the Maitlands, she must help them fend off the advances of the unruly and dangerous entity Betelgeuse, who seeks to manipulate her for his own gain. |
A young girl's attempts to connect with the afterlife leads her to unleash a malevolent spirit, Betelgeuse, who threatens to take over the house and the lives of its new living occupants, the Deetz family. |
A recently deceased couple, the Maitlands, must team up with a rebellious teenage girl to stop a demonic entity, Betelgeuse, from overtaking their home and marrying the girl against her will. |
After a family moves into a haunted house, a young girl befriends the ghosts of the previous owners and must help them battle an ancient, nefarious spirit that seeks to exploit her for its own dark purposes. |
When a troubled teen discovers that her family's new home is inhabited by the ghosts of the previous owners, she must use her wits and courage to protect them from a malicious supernatural force determined to claim the house for its own. |
A recently deceased couple struggles to adapt to the afterlife and must enlist the help of a mischievous bio-exorcist to scare away the obnoxious new inhabitants of their home. |
When a quirky goth teenager discovers she can see ghosts, she befriends a deceased couple and helps them navigate the bizarre bureaucracy of the afterlife. |
A bio-exorcist with a penchant for chaos is unleashed upon a small town, causing mayhem and forcing a family to confront their own mortality. |
A dark comedy that explores the afterlife with wit and imagination, following a deceased couple's attempts to reclaim their home and a teenager's journey of self-discovery. |
Beetlejuice offers a hilarious and heartwarming look at life after death, reminding us that family and acceptance are what truly matter, even in the afterlife. |
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