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# PG SLUGLINE
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INT. ABC SPORTS’ 1972 OLYMPICS STUDIO, CONTROL ROOM - DAY CLOSE UP: A gun is raised. BANG. VOICE (O.C.) Cut to 1. WIDE SHOT: An Olympic swimming pool. The swimmers dive off
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INT. HOTEL SHERATON, MUNICH - NIGHT It’s the middle of the night. We’re in a small hotel room. The TV is on. Muted. Sports images flicker on the screen. A MAN sits at the edge of the bed. Fully dressed. We can only
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INT. ABC TV STUDIO, CORRIDOR, HALLWAY - NIGHT Geoff walks down a dark corridor into the hallway. ABC Sports Operations’ VP MARVIN BADER (45) already waits for him. Despite two decades in the TV business, Bader hasn’t lost his moral compass. He exudes great kindness, with an
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT An unexpected heat smacks Geoff in the face as he enters. BADER (whispers) AC’s broken.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT The ASSISTANT DIRECTOR says the crew’s favorite phrase: ASSISTANT DIRECTOR And we’re clear. COMMUNICATOR
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INT. HALLWAY - NIGHT Roone walks fast, Bader next to him, Geoff follows, trying to find space for himself in the hallway. Roone turns around to Geoff. ROONE
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INT. VTR LIBRARY - NIGHT A room full of videotapes and film rolls. Geoff’s fingers are gliding over the shelves. Looking for something specific. INT. EDITING ROOM - NIGHT
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INT. VTR ROOM - NIGHT Geoff skillfully threads a magnetic tape into the VTR machine. Hits fast forward. Images of Fidel Castro, Cuba, communist parades fizzle across the machine’s monitor. JACQUES (O.S.)
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INT. STUDIO STAGE - NIGHT Close up on Hermann ranting. HERMANN Wo dad ma denn da hin kommen, wenn ein jeder nur noch mehr Zeug will?
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INT. VTR ROOM - NIGHT A RED LIGHT flashes on a phone. Geoff doesn’t notice it. He’s hard at work editing. Rewinding an atomic bomb explosion. The mushroom shrinks in on itself. All we hear is the music in his headphones.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT Geoff hands Marianne a phone. She dials. MARIANNE Ja hallo, mein Name ist Marianne Gebhardt, ich rufe aus dem Studio
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT Geoff sits behind the console. Jacques calls out from behind the monitor wall. JACQUES Still getting dropouts?
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INT. STORAGE ROOM - DAWN Bader lies on a cot, asleep. The door flings opens. Light slashes into the dark room, startling Bader awake. GEOFF
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Geoff returns, hands Jacques the radio. GEOFF Tune in on BR. He picks up the phone. Dials. Puts it on a phone amplifier.
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Through a cloud of nicotine we follow a tall, good-looking man down the hall. A certain confidence in his attitude. PETER JENNINGS (34) is the only reporter from the ABC News division on the Sports crew here, one who believes being a
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY His gait is fast. At the other end, Roone enters. Instead of his suit, he’s now in an ABC crew windbreaker, sleeves rolled up. ROONE
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Bader walks down the hall, sees Marianne enter from outside. BADER Anything about the hostages yet? MARIANNE
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INT. STUDIO STAGE - DAY Geoff and Carter stare at one of the three gigantic studio cameras. CARTER You know how heavy those are?
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Geoff, Jacques and Carter wiggle the heavy camera out of the studio into the corridor. Geoff’s walkie crackles: BADER Geoff, you there?
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INT. ROONE’S OFFICE - DAY Roone, electric shaver in his hand, listens to the phone on loudspeaker. This is the part of the job he hates. CBS .... I’m sorry, there is nothing I
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY The enormous camera is shoved down the hall by Geoff, Jacques and Carter. ROONE What the hell are you guys doing?
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INT. VTR LIBRARY - DAY Marianne has the Israeli delegation in front of her. She circles profiles and takes notes, while on the phone: MARIANNE Du hast von zehn Geiseln
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY The crew people have started up their work again. A Stage Runner (”JJ”) passes coffee mugs around. As Geoff rushes in, Jacques hands him the phone. Geoff puts it on the amplifier.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY The room is increasingly filling up with staff. Hermann sets up fans to counter the rising heat. Everyone listens intently to Jennings’ descriptions: JENNINGS
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Jennings continues to report over the phone: JENNINGS Now it looks like there are negotiations happening. German
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY WHAM - The large studio door flies open. Gary swoops in, gym bag in hand. The Assistant Editor already waits for him. Gary hands her the film magazines from the gym bag. She
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY INSERT: An unscrewed phone earpiece. Next to a stripped audio cable. Hank aims the soldering iron at the earpiece. A thin thread of smoke rises. The control room is now packed. The entire crew is back.
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Bader and Roone step out into the hallway. BADER You don’t want anybody to see their kid being executed on live
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INT. EDITING ROOM - DAY Gladys sits at the Title Generator. Headset on, eyes focused on the preview monitor. GLADYS Title 1 ready for insert.
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INT. VTR ROOM - DAY A VTR TECHNICIAN stands at one of one of the gigantic VTR Machines. Tape starts rolling. MCKAY VTR TECH (over speakers) (quietly into headset)
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INT. EDITING ROOM - DAY Marianne listens to the radio in the quiet room. Taking notes. Behind her Hank scans the shelves, looking through audio tracks. Carter enters with newly developed film rolls. He threads the film into the Steenbeck. Hits play.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Geoff stares at the Main Monitor: MCKAY The Olympics at this moment are still continuing.
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INT. TRANSMISSION ROOM - DAY INSERT: The housing of a transistor radio is removed. Hank twiddles with the condenser, while Carter connects the antenna to an improvised extension wire. Marianne stands nearby, surveys the huge transmitting console
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Jennings excitedly reports over the phone: JENNINGS Something’s happening here in Connollystrasse.
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY JJ is at the catering table, peanut buttering slices of toast at impressive speed. INT. TRANSMISSION ROOM - DAY The CB by Marianne crackles:
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INT. VTR ROOM - DAY The VTR Technician stops the tape. Grabs two checkers. Sticks one in each roll. Uses them as handles to pull the tape through the rollers in a steady, slow movement. VTR TECHNICIAN
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY GEOFF (back to business) 30 seconds. Roone comes in for this. He sits next to Geoff.
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INT. EDITING ROOM - DAY (FORMERLY 55) Gladys speeds to the Title Generator. Carefully lays a tiny “ABC Sports” Logo on the top corner of the board. Swiftly slides it underneath the table camera. Frames it. INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY
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INT. TRANSMISSION ROOM - DAY The CB by Marianne crackles: POLICE CHANNEL (Voice #2) Die Massen ausm Stadion laufen alle
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY -- bumps into ABC staff in the hall. No time to apologize. She rushes to the control room door, wrenches it open. INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY MARIANNE
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INT. TRANSMISSION ROOM - DAY Marianne arrives out of breath. Sits by the CB radio, listening to the German police communicate. POLICE CHANNEL (Voice #3)
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Four uniformed German POLICE OFFICERS storm down the hall -- run to the door with the glowing “On Air” light. INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Door slams open as the Police charge in. Geoff and the crew
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Geoff and Bader talk quietly in the hall. BADER They should have cut the electricity in the apartment. It’s
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY McKay is on the main monitor, while the live monitors show nothing but black. Geoff listens to Jennings descriptions. JENNINGS (over phone)
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INT. ROONE’S OFFICE - DAY Roone’s TV shows McKay in the studio as we hear Jennings: JENNINGS We’ve seen two hostages so far. They were led to the window one
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Jennings continues to describe the events at the scene. JENNINGS It looks like Spitzer wants to tell Genscher something.
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY An Assistant rushes through the aisles. Maps under her arm. We follow her into the buzzing control room -- INT. CONTROL ROOM - DAY Carter runs towards her and takes the maps.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT The roars become deafening. The action outside has come very close to the small studio. Gladys comes back in, followed by Roone: ROONE
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT Geoff turns to Jacques. GEOFF Sports? Is he fucking serious? JACQUES
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT On the main monitor Jim struggles making the transition from terror to sports: MCKAY ABC Sports News will be keeping you
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INT. ABC STUDIO / HALLWAY - NIGHT The mighty studio camera is being rolled back in when Carter appears behind it and runs into the hallway, carrying a film can. Geoff rushes to meet him.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT Fullscreen main monitor: ...the camera chases silhouettes through the night. Towards the faint glow in the distance. Tanks roll across the fields, heading in the same direction.
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT Bader storms in, walks straight towards Geoff. BADER Everybody is reporting it now. They are all following our lead.
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INT. ROONE’S OFFICE - NIGHT Bader charges in, excitedly waving the AP Wire. Roone is on the phone, smiling, showing the AP Wire in his hands. ROONE (covers phone, to Bader)
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT On the line monitor McKay finishes with Ahlers. The commercial break starts. GEOFF Ok. Thanks, everyone.
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INT. ROONE’S OFFICE - NIGHT Bader screams into the phone: BADER ... I know that’s not true! I got a fucking TV set too!
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INT. HALLWAY - NIGHT --the empty hallway. Roone closes the door behind them. Bader looks at the ground. Removes his glasses. Can’t even start to talk. ROONE
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INT. CONTROL ROOM - NIGHT He walks to the phone like a man about to be hung. All eyes on him. He picks up the receiver. GEOFF Marianne?
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INT. HALLWAY - NIGHT The show is over. Geoff watches the crew members leave the building, dejected. He looks through the storage room window to see two worn faces:
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INT. ROONE’S OFFICE - NIGHT Geoff enters. Roone’s on the phone. ROONE (into phone) Hold on one second.
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September 5

During the 1972 Munich Olympics, an ABC Sports crew finds itself caught in the heart of a hostage crisis, battling technical challenges and ethical dilemmas to bring the world the story. Other loglines ›

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's USP lies in its ability to artfully blend real-world historical events with a deeply personal and emotionally resonant story. By focusing on the experiences of the ABC Sports crew, the writer creates a unique perspective that allows the audience to witness the unfolding tragedy through the eyes of those tasked with reporting on it. The screenplay's strong character development, particularly the journey of Geoff Mason, and its exploration of the moral and ethical dilemmas faced by the crew, make it a compelling and thought-provoking piece of storytelling that sets it apart from other sports-related dramas.

AI Verdict

How to read these: in industry coverage, Pass is the default outcome for the majority of professional scripts, and Consider means the reader stayed in the room. Industry-wide, the median professional evaluation sits at a 6 — scores of 8+ are rare everywhere, on purpose.

Synthesis Where readers agree and split
7.5

The script's immersive control-room procedural engine and distinctive broadcast mechanics sustain a Recommend, and it will move into championable territory once the protagonist's interiority and the final act's causal chain are tightened.

Read as Prestige Elevated commercial
Genres Thriller5 Historical5 Drama4

A prestige historical procedural that uses the real-time mechanics of 1970s live broadcasting to generate sustained moral pressure and journalistic tension during a historical tragedy.

Why not lower

The procedural mechanics, technical precision, and distinctive broadcast engine are strong enough to anchor a Recommend despite the emotional and structural gaps in the final act.

Why not higher

The unresolved relationship between the broadcast and the crisis, alongside the protagonist's externalized interiority and the final act's underpowered emotional payoff, prevents the script from reaching a higher band.

Rewrite map

A script with a distinctive, immersive control-room procedural engine that needs targeted work on protagonist interiority and the emotional payoff of the final act.

Read as Prestige / Elevated commercial

Start here

Re-anchoring the protagonist's governing desire after the midpoint to a specific ethical or personal stake will simultaneously clarify the causal chain in the final act and provide the emotional architecture needed for the ending to land.

Protect while fixing 2
Control room procedural texture

Tightening the middle act or adding interior beats risks flattening the overlapping technical jargon and monitor choreography that generates the script's primary suspense.

Keep the concrete work of getting a picture and voice to air intact; any added emotional beats should be as restrained and observational as the existing register, using the technical environment to externalize feeling rather than replacing it with dialogue.

Ethical debate spine

Addressing the unresolved broadcast ethics by adding explicit rules or consequences could tip the script into didacticism, overriding the nuanced friction between Roone and Bader.

Let the ethical tension emerge from on-air decisions and visible fallout rather than adding new thematic dialogue; keep Roone's visionary drive and Bader's moral compass in active friction without making either a clear villain.

Fix first 3
Final-act emotional payoff underdelivers

The reader stays engaged with the protagonist as a competent operator but is denied a commensurate emotional reckoning when the tragedy concludes, leaving the ending feeling like procedural closure rather than human consequence.

Root cause

The script's procedural register crowds out character interiority, tracking the day through logistical tasks rather than moments of private reckoning after each escalation.

One direction

Insert brief, economical interior beats after major escalations or extend the final sequence to allow the protagonist a sustained moment of reflection that retroactively colors the day's events.

Back-half pressure diffuses into reported updates Readers disagree on cause

The reader's urgency shifts from watching the crisis unfold to waiting for news of it, so the most lethal moments feel distant at the point where tension should peak.

Root cause

The script moves the camera away from the events in the final act, relying on relayed reports and historical record rather than dramatized control-room decisions that directly impact the outcome.

One direction

Restore a partial visual or sensory point of view on the airport, or make the control room's failure to see it the explicit dramatic focus with visible consequences for their choices.

Ensemble reads as functional rather than personal Less critical

The reader understands what each crew member does but not what they stand to lose, making the collective devastation land on a machine rather than on specific people.

Root cause

The script prioritizes professional competence and procedural mechanics over individuating personal stakes, resolving character moments into logistical tasks.

One direction

Give one or two secondary characters a single personal beat or gesture that runs through the script, letting their professional actions reflect an underlying private cost.

Your decisions 1
Final-act register: emotional reckoning vs. procedural restraint Consequential
Side A

Committing to emotional reckoning means extending the final sequence to give the crew a sustained moment of processing, which risks sentimentality but delivers the catharsis the buildup demands.

Side B

Committing to procedural restraint means keeping the ending muted and relying on visual details or silence to carry the weight, which preserves tonal integrity but requires the preceding causal chain to be airtight.

Quick credibility wins 2
Inconsistent names and typos

Run a strict proofread pass to standardize character names (Marianne/Mary-Ann, McKay/KcKay) and fix transcription errors (hHeadquaters, Isreali, assault riffles) that undermine the script's factual precision.

Overwritten action emphasis

Strip caps, exclamation marks, and evaluative adjectives from action lines describing live footage, trusting the staged images and the script's restrained register to carry the intensity.

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Would readers champion it · Rewrite depth · Voice · Score stability
What's working 4 of 5 readers agree

The ensemble converges on the control room's immersive procedural texture and live-broadcast mechanics as the script's primary championable asset.

What's blocking 4 of 5 readers agree

Four models identify the protagonist's externalized interiority and the final act's underpowered emotional payoff as the primary barrier to a higher verdict.

Would readers champion it?
Not yetNot yetReaders wouldn’t actively push for it.
Early interestEarly interestMentioned, but no real push behind it.
ModeratelyModeratelyMentioned favorably to the right buyer.
StronglyStronglyActively championed across their network.
ClaudeStronglyGeminiStronglyDeepSeekModeratelyGPT5ModeratelyGrokModerately
How much rewrite does it need?
Start from scratchStart from scratchPremise or core engine isn’t working. Page-one rebuild.
Structural rewriteStructural rewriteSpecific acts or zones need rebuilding — not starting over, but significant revision work on those sections.
Targeted rewriteTargeted rewriteSpecific scenes or threads need rework. ~1 month.
Just polishJust polishLines and pacing tweaks. A few weeks.
ClaudeTargeted rewriteDeepSeekTargeted rewriteGPT5Targeted rewriteGeminiTargeted rewriteGrokStructural rewrite
How distinctive is the voice?
GenericGenericReads like other scripts in the genre.
EmergingEmergingHints of a distinctive voice, not yet locked in.
DistinctiveDistinctiveA clear, recognizable authorial voice.
One-of-a-kindOne-of-a-kindA voice that couldn’t be anyone else’s.
ClaudeDistinctiveDeepSeekDistinctiveGPT5DistinctiveGeminiDistinctiveGrokDistinctive

On the score: The score sits at the high edge of its band — a focused revision could push it to the next verdict.

Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Thriller 50%

Setting: 1972, Munich, Germany during the Summer Olympics

Themes: The ethical dilemmas of live broadcasting during a crisis., The contrast between the carefree atmosphere of the Olympics and the horrific reality of the terrorist attack., The cultural clash between German and American perspectives on the event., The personal toll of witnessing trauma and the human cost of conflict., The power of live television to shape public perception and influence events.

Conflict & Stakes: The primary conflict revolves around the urgent and chaotic situation of the hostage crisis during the Olympics, with the stakes being the safety of the hostages and the ethical implications of broadcasting the events live.

Mood: Tense and urgent, with moments of somber reflection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The real-time coverage of a hostage crisis during a major international sporting event, blending sports and journalism.
  • Major Twist: The unexpected escalation of the hostage situation, leading to tragic outcomes that challenge the characters' moral compasses.
  • Distinctive Setting: The backdrop of the 1972 Munich Olympics, a historically significant event that adds depth and urgency to the narrative.
  • Innovative Ideas: Exploration of the ethical dilemmas faced by journalists in crisis situations, highlighting the impact of media on real-world events.

Comparable Scripts: The Killing Fields, All the President's Men, Spotlight, The Report, The Day the Clown Cried, The Newsroom, The Munich Massacre, The Siege, The Bourne Ultimatum

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