The apartment

A lonely insurance clerk lets his apartment be used by his philandering bosses — until a colleague's suicide attempt forces him to choose between career advancement and doing the right thing, with love and integrity on the line.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its ability to balance biting corporate satire with genuine human emotion, creating a story that is both hilarious and heartbreaking. Its exploration of moral compromise in the workplace feels remarkably contemporary, while the central romance develops with uncommon authenticity. The film's distinctive voice-over technique and seamless integration of comedy and drama set it apart from conventional romantic comedies.

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GPT5
 Highly Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Highly Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Highly Recommend
Average Score: 9.2
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script is structurally sound and emotionally rich, but the single biggest craft fix is to deepen Fran’s interiority and agency. Right now key dramatic turns (the overdose, the reconciliation, her choices about Sheldrake) are seen mostly through Bud’s reactions. Give Fran active beats that reveal motive, backstory and desire — private moments, decisions that propel the plot, and scenes where she drives the action rather than being a prize or catalyst. While you’re at it, tighten a few middle-act detours so the overdose and moral crisis land with maximal force and the tonal shifts feel earned.
For Executives:
This is a high-value, near-classic property: commercial, awards-friendly, and durable because it balances comedy, satire and real drama. The main risk for contemporary release is perception: Fran’s underwritten agency and some period attitudes could read as dated and expose the project to criticism. A focused rewrite (strengthen Fran’s arc, streamline middle-act pacing, and emphasize the ethical stakes of the apartment/key scheme) will preserve the film’s strengths while reducing PR and audience risks — increasing appeal to modern distributors and awards voters without losing the original tone.
Story Facts

Genres: Drama, Comedy, Romance, Character Study, Romantic Comedy, Family

Setting: 1959, New York City, primarily in a brownstone apartment and corporate office buildings

Themes: Integrity vs. Ambition, Loneliness and Connection, Exploitation and Power Dynamics, Infidelity and Moral Compromise, Redemption and Empathy

Conflict & Stakes: Bud's struggle to navigate his feelings for Fran while dealing with Sheldrake's manipulative behavior and the consequences of their affair, with personal and professional stakes at risk.

Mood: Bittersweet and comedic, with moments of tension and romance.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The use of an apartment as a central plot device for romantic entanglements and corporate manipulation.
  • Character Dynamics: The complex relationships between Bud, Fran, and Sheldrake create a rich narrative filled with tension and humor.
  • Setting: The 1950s New York City backdrop adds a nostalgic charm and enhances the story's themes of ambition and romance.
  • Humor and Heart: The screenplay balances comedic elements with serious themes, making it both entertaining and thought-provoking.

Comparable Scripts: The Apartment (1960), The Graduate (1967), Mad Men (TV Series, 2007-2015), The Secret Life of Walter Mitty (2013), The Odd Couple (Play/Film, 1965), The 40-Year-Old Virgin (2005), The Pursuit of Happyness (2006), The Office (US, TV Series, 2005-2013), The Great Gatsby (Novel, 1925)

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.69
Key Suggestions:
Focus your revision on deepening secondary characters (especially Sheldrake) and tightening repetitive apartment sequences. Give antagonists internal conflicts and small vulnerable moments so their demands on Bud feel earned, and cut or compress recurring ‘apartment-for-access’ beats so pacing and stakes rise steadily toward Fran’s crisis and Bud’s transformation. Also lighten explicit exposition—show through action, props, and silence rather than telling—to preserve the script’s emotional authenticity.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core—Bud's lonely, principled soul set against a predatory corporate microcosm—is strong and emotionally resonant. To lift the whole piece, tighten the opening exposition, then slow and deepen the middle so we can feel the cumulative cost of Bud's compromises: show his inner deterioration, add scenes that reveal Fran's backstory and motives, and give Sheldrake a more textured moral life. Recalibrate pacing after the promotion so the stakes land organically, and treat Fran's suicidal moment with more psychological nuance and aftermath to avoid melodrama and preserve empathy.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core—Bud's journey from a lonely, people-pleasing everyman to someone who chooses integrity and love—is strong and resonant. To make that payoff unavoidable, tighten the build: seed Bud's internal conflict earlier and more visibly (small hesitations, a brief Cincinnati flash/memory, or a private rule he breaks), lean into his statistical voice as a revealing tic rather than only a gag, and give Fran slightly more agency in the middle beats so her collapse and recovery feel earned rather than abrupt. Also consider softening Sheldrake's one-note villainy with a moment of ambiguity or private regret so the antagonist feels more human and the stakes of Bud's stand become sharper.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional backbone is strong—Bud's vulnerability and the tonal shift from workplace comedy to personal drama work—but pacing and character empathy need tightening. Focus on modulating intensity around the suicide sequence (give the audience brief relief moments to process), deepen Fran's inner life so her choices feel motivated and maintain audience sympathy, and make Sheldrake's manipulation/its consequences hit harder (show Bud's internal conflict when he hands over the key). Small added beats—one or two quiet, warm scenes before the dramatic turn and a slightly longer, lingering final moment—will make the emotional arc feel earned and more satisfying.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows Bud’s arc is strong: he moves from passive conformity to choosing love and integrity. To improve the script, tighten the cause-and-effect showing how each compromise accumulates and raises the emotional cost of staying compliant. Make Bud’s decisive break feel earned by heightening earlier moral decisions, clarifying the moments he says “yes” under pressure, and adding one or two concrete scenes where giving in costs him something meaningful (reputation, trust, a clear opportunity). Also consider expanding Fran’s agency so the final commitment reads as mutual, not simply Bud’s rescue.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s emotional core—Bud’s choice to choose integrity and real connection over corporate compromise—is strong but not always earned on-screen. Tighten the arc so each escalation of exploitation (the apartment key, the executives’ favors, Sheldrake’s manipulation) forces a visible, consequential choice from Bud. Trim repetitive beat scenes that undercut momentum, and deepen Fran’s agency so the romance feels mutual rather than salvific. Use recurring concrete motifs (the key, the calendar, the bowler hat) to show internal change rather than tell it; sharpen dialogue to reveal character costs, not just comic texture.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong emotional core and likable central characters, but two structural weaknesses threaten audience buy‑in: Bud's late, abrupt assertiveness feels unearned, and Fran's suicide attempt depends on an improbable coincidence. Fix these by seeding Bud's turning point earlier (small acts of agency, escalating moral friction with Sheldrake, and clearer internal stakes) and by reworking the overdose scene so its discovery and motivation are believable (either by shifting timing, adding connecting beats that bring Bud back, or having another plausible discoverer). Also trim redundant key-exchange scenes and reduce expository voice-over so emotional moments land organically.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your script’s voice — wry, observant, and quietly compassionate — is a major asset. Preserve the crisp, dialogue-driven humor and the mix of irony with genuine feeling, but tighten the storytelling so that the emotional through-line (Bud’s growth from passive “nebbish” to someone who claims his life) registers more clearly. Trim or consolidate episodic beats that mainly repeat the same character dynamics, cut back on explanatory voice-over where scenes can show the same information, and deepen a few intimate moments (especially around Fran) so the audience experiences the transformation rather than being told about it.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Your script already excels at scene-by-scene construction, comic timing, and creating vivid workplace microcosms. To raise it from very good to memorable, focus on enriching the subtext of your dialogue and deepening characters' moral complexity. Rework key scenes so conversations carry hidden agendas, contradictory desires, and internal stakes; escalate conflicts incrementally so emotional moments land with greater force. Use the suggested exercises (especially 'Dialogue with Conflicting Motivations' and 'Moral Dilemma Scene') and study the recommended Wilder/Diamond screenplays to learn how to marry humor with genuine pathos without undercutting either.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a richly drawn period world and a humane central character, but it drifts into episodic detail and repetitive set pieces (parties, bars, apartment visitors) that dilute dramatic momentum and the emotional stakes. Focus the script by sharpening Bud and Fran's agency: consolidate scenes that repeat the same beats, make Bud's moral/strategic choices more active and consequential earlier, and tighten the throughline that connects his promotion, the apartment-key compromises, and Fran's crisis. Use the physical world (office hierarchy, cramped apartment, elevator interactions) to reveal character choices visually rather than by exposition.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's emotional resonance and engagement, consider intensifying the conflict and emotional stakes in the early scenes. While the dialogue and character development are strong, the initial lack of emotional impact may hinder audience connection. Balancing humor with deeper emotional moments will create a more compelling narrative arc and keep viewers invested throughout.
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