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# PG SLUGLINE
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INT LIVING ROOM — NIGHT
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INT UPSTAIRS BATHROOM – SAME TIME
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INT KITCHEN – MOMENTS LATER
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INT HALLWAY / FRONT DOOR – CONTINUOUS
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EXT DRIVEWAY – MORNING
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EXT SIDEWALK – CONTINUOUS
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH – HALLWAY – MORNING
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH – MAIN HALL – MORNING
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH — HALLWAY — LATE AFTERNOON
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EXT STONEGROVE — WALK HOME / BUS STOP / SIDE STREET —
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EXT THE LOOP – LATE AFTERNOON
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EXT THE STRIP – DUSK
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EXT FOOD SPOT / LOW WALL – CONTINUOUS
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EXT THE STRIP – WALKWAY (BOYS) — DUSK (REVISED)
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EXT STRIP – BENCH / LOW WALL — MOMENTS LATER
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EXT SCHOOL FENCE / FOREST EDGE — NIGHT
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# PG SLUGLINE
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INT LIVING ROOM — NIGHT
INT. LIVING ROOM — NIGHT
INT. LIVING ROOM — NIGHT Controllers clicking. A game blares. Gio leans forward, locked in. GIO
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INT UPSTAIRS BATHROOM – SAME TIME
INT. UPSTAIRS BATHROOM – SAME TIME
INT. UPSTAIRS BATHROOM – SAME TIME This bathroom is medium-sized, not built for traffic. SUMMER is at the mirror fixing her hair. VERA leans against the counter, tying her shoes. SADIE stands in the doorway, fully ready, keys in hand.
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INT KITCHEN – MOMENTS LATER
INT. KITCHEN – MOMENTS LATER
INT. KITCHEN – MOMENTS LATER The house fills with noise. Backpacks thud. Shoes squeak. SUMMER’S MOM stands at the counter, coffee in hand, untouched. She’s dressed, composed — but distant.
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INT HALLWAY / FRONT DOOR – CONTINUOUS
INT. HALLWAY / FRONT DOOR – CONTINUOUS
INT. HALLWAY / FRONT DOOR – CONTINUOUS Sadie jingles her keys. SADIE Alright. Move it, asshats. I’m not missing drop-off traffic for you.
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EXT DRIVEWAY – MORNING
EXT. DRIVEWAY – MORNING
EXT. DRIVEWAY – MORNING They load into Sadie’s car. Summer pauses at the door, glancing back inside. Her mom stands in the kitchen, watching them leave. They lock eyes.
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EXT SIDEWALK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SIDEWALK – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SIDEWALK – CONTINUOUS HENDRIX, GIO, MAX, VERA, and SUMMER walk in a loose pack, backpacks slung, arguing over each other. GIO I’m telling you, if the teacher already hates you—
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH – HALLWAY – MORNING
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH – HALLWAY – MORNING
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH – HALLWAY – MORNING Lockers slam. Voices overlap. Shoes squeak on tile. PA system goes off : welcome freshman to your first day at - (cuts off when they splits ) The group moves together — instinctively.
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH – MAIN HALL – MORNING
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH – MAIN HALL – MORNING
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH – MAIN HALL – MORNING The hallway opens up here. Wider. Brighter. Lockers slam. Voices overlap. Shoes squeak on tile.
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INT STONEGROVE HIGH — HALLWAY — LATE AFTERNOON
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH — HALLWAY — LATE AFTERNOON
INT. STONEGROVE HIGH — HALLWAY — LATE AFTERNOON A TEACHER’S VOICE drones mid-sentence. The BELL RINGS — sharp, relieving. Lockers SLAM. Chairs scrape.
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EXT STONEGROVE — WALK HOME / BUS STOP / SIDE STREET —
EXT. STONEGROVE — WALK HOME / BUS STOP / SIDE STREET —
EXT. STONEGROVE — WALK HOME / BUS STOP / SIDE STREET — LATE AFTERNOON EXT. SIDE STREET — LATE AFTERNOON The group walks together. Not rushed.
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EXT THE LOOP – LATE AFTERNOON
EXT. THE LOOP – LATE AFTERNOON
EXT. THE LOOP – LATE AFTERNOON The sun hangs low. Heat still clings to everything, but the breeze helps. The group sprawls out across the grass and curb like they’ve done this a hundred times.
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EXT THE STRIP – DUSK
EXT. THE STRIP – DUSK
EXT. THE STRIP – DUSK Neon flickers on as daylight fades. Music leaks from storefronts. Laughter. Traffic rolling slow. Alive.
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EXT FOOD SPOT / LOW WALL – CONTINUOUS
EXT. FOOD SPOT / LOW WALL – CONTINUOUS
EXT. FOOD SPOT / LOW WALL – CONTINUOUS They stop near a low concrete wall. Paper bags. Plastic trays. Drinks sweating in the heat. They eat half-standing, half-sitting, constantly shifting. No one fully relaxes.
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EXT THE STRIP – WALKWAY (BOYS) — DUSK (REVISED)
EXT. THE STRIP – WALKWAY (BOYS) — DUSK (REVISED)
EXT. THE STRIP – WALKWAY (BOYS) — DUSK (REVISED) They move through the Strip’s evening noise. Music leaks from storefronts. Shoes scrape pavement. Conversations overlap.
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EXT STRIP – BENCH / LOW WALL — MOMENTS LATER
EXT. STRIP – BENCH / LOW WALL — MOMENTS LATER
EXT. STRIP – BENCH / LOW WALL — MOMENTS LATER They sit. Not relaxing. Just grounding. Hendrix presses his palm lightly to his ribs again.
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EXT SCHOOL FENCE / FOREST EDGE — NIGHT
EXT. SCHOOL FENCE / FOREST EDGE — NIGHT
EXT. SCHOOL FENCE / FOREST EDGE — NIGHT MR. THOMAS REED stands at the edge of the property. Behind him: school lights. buzzing electricity.

Before We Knew

When an invisible, reality-stealing phenomenon starts interrupting the world around them — pausing sound, leaving holes where floors should be, and marking bodies — a tight-knit group of teens must decide whether to investigate the disappearances in their town before the silence swallows someone they love.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script distinguishes itself through its authentic portrayal of teenage friendship as the foundation for supernatural horror. Unlike typical teen horror that relies on jump scares, it builds dread through subtle environmental anomalies and the characters' gradual realization that their reality is unraveling. The unique selling proposition is the 'quiet apocalypse' concept—the horror emerges not from monsters but from reality itself becoming unreliable, with the characters' relationships serving as the emotional anchor. The script's restraint in revealing its supernatural elements creates genuine unease rather than shock.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
Claude
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Average Score: 7.9
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To strengthen the script's craft, prioritize clarifying Hendrix's protagonist arc by giving him a decisive objective and emotional journey within the pilot, ensuring he makes a key decision that propels the story forward. Additionally, define the rules and stakes of the supernatural phenomenon more explicitly early on to build tension and avoid ambiguity, while tightening pacing in transitional scenes to maintain momentum and focus on character-driven conflict, ultimately transforming the pilot from an atmospheric setup into a more engaging, self-contained episode.
For Executives:
The script has solid market value with its atmospheric teen ensemble mystery, evoking comparisons to hits like Stranger Things, offering potential for a dedicated audience in the supernatural drama genre. However, risks include unclear protagonist development and vague stakes that could lead to audience confusion and disengagement, potentially limiting commercial appeal and series viability if not refined, as executives may see it as a promising but underdeveloped concept in a competitive landscape.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 50% Horror 35% Thriller 25% Comedy 15%

Setting: Contemporary, Stonegrove, a suburban town with a high school, residential areas, and a vibrant strip with shops and eateries.

Themes: The Unseen and Unacknowledged Supernatural/Uncanny, Denial, Avoidance, and Forced Normalcy, Observation vs. Obliviousness, Underlying Dread and Lingering Tension, Secrecy and Unspoken Burdens, Cyclical Nature and Unresolved Issues

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around the supernatural anomalies affecting the characters, particularly Hendrix's unexplained physical pain and the mysterious occurrences in their environment, which threaten their safety and understanding of reality.

Mood: Eerie and introspective, with moments of humor and camaraderie.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The integration of supernatural phenomena into the everyday lives of teenagers, creating a blend of horror and coming-of-age themes.
  • Plot Twist: Hendrix's unexplained physical pain and the mysterious events that unfold, leading to a deeper exploration of the characters' fears and relationships.
  • Distinctive Setting: The suburban town of Stonegrove, which contrasts the normalcy of teenage life with the eerie supernatural occurrences.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of everyday settings like a high school and local strip to ground the supernatural elements, making them more relatable.

Comparable Scripts: Stranger Things, It Follows, The Goonies, Super 8, The Haunting of Hill House, Eerie Indiana, The Upside Down, Ghostbusters, A Quiet Place

🎯 Your Top Priorities

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

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Improving Emotional Impact (Script Level) and Theme (Script Level) will have the biggest impact on your overall score next draft.

1. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 7.1
Expected gain: ~6% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.7 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~2,329 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.7 in one rewrite.
2. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 7.8
Expected gain: ~6% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Theme (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~3,464 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
3. Premise (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Premise (Script Level) score: 7.7
Expected gain: ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.43 in Premise (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~2,335 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Premise (Script Level) by about +0.43 in one rewrite.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.44
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script's creative craft, prioritize deepening character emotional depth and vulnerability by incorporating introspective moments during supernatural events, as this will enhance relatability and engagement. Additionally, clarify the supernatural elements and refine pacing in dialogue-heavy or mundane scenes to ensure a smoother narrative flow and stronger audience connection, drawing from successful examples like 'Stranger Things' for inspiration.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in building character dynamics and a tense atmosphere, but to elevate it, focus on refining pacing for smoother transitions between mundane and supernatural elements, and clearly define the central mystery to deepen emotional stakes and viewer engagement. Incorporating better foreshadowing and tighter dialogue will create a more cohesive narrative, enhancing the overall craft and impact of the story.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals that while the protagonists have strong foundational traits, many lack significant emotional growth and depth, particularly in their arcs and interactions. To improve the script from a creative standpoint, focus on incorporating transformation triggers and exploring backstories to add complexity, ensuring characters evolve beyond stasis and resonate more deeply with audiences. Emphasizing vulnerabilities and relational dynamics in key scenes, such as the recurring weak point in scene 3, will enhance emotional resonance and make the narrative more compelling.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's emotional craft, focus on diversifying the emotional range by incorporating more positive emotions and moments of genuine joy to contrast with the suspenseful elements, while enhancing character depth through personal revelations and better-paced emotional transitions. This will create a more dynamic narrative that avoids monotony, builds stronger audience empathy, and ensures that supernatural events land with greater impact, making the story more compelling and character-driven.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strength lies in its exploration of internal conflicts and philosophical themes, but to improve, focus on resolving the protagonist's avoidance of vulnerability earlier in the narrative. By incorporating scenes that challenge the character's facade and force authentic interactions, the writer can enhance character development and emotional depth, making the story more engaging and thematically resonant, while ensuring that the unresolved elements build anticipation rather than frustration.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script masterfully weaves supernatural elements with everyday teen life, creating a palpable sense of dread, but to elevate it, focus on deepening character arcs—particularly how individuals like Hendrix and Max evolve in their awareness—to make the theme of denial more nuanced and less repetitive. This would enhance emotional stakes and craft a more compelling narrative that balances horror with relatable human experiences, ensuring the uncanny intrusions feel personal and impactful rather than formulaic.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's analysis reveals key areas for improvement in character development, narrative consistency, and pacing. By ensuring character actions are deeply motivated and tied to their personalities, addressing gaps in how supernatural elements are handled to build a cohesive mystery, and reducing repetitive scenes to streamline the story, the writer can enhance authenticity, engagement, and overall craft, making the script more compelling and polished.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice effectively uses subtle dialogue and descriptions to build tension and reveal character dynamics, but to enhance its craft, consider introducing more varied emotional expressions or moments of direct confrontation to prevent the understated style from becoming too predictable or emotionally distant. This would amplify the suspense and make character arcs more engaging, ensuring the mystery elements land with greater impact. Overall, leveraging the strength in naturalistic interactions while balancing subtlety with clarity could elevate the script's depth and appeal.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay excels in character dynamics and tension-building, but to elevate it, focus on refining dialogue for authenticity, experimenting with pacing to heighten suspense, and deepening character motivations to enrich emotional layers. Incorporating suggested exercises, like writing scenes with minimal dialogue or escalating tension, will sharpen your craft and make the narrative more compelling and resonant.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world-building in this script masterfully contrasts mundane suburban life with subtle supernatural elements, creating a palpable tension that drives suspense and character development. To enhance the craft, focus on integrating these anomalies more deeply into character arcs and daily routines, ensuring that supernatural events feel organic and reveal personal growth or conflicts, while avoiding over-reliance on familiar tropes to maintain originality and emotional resonance.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The scene pattern analysis highlights strengths in tense, emotionally charged scenes but reveals weaknesses in lighter moments that can dilute conflict and pacing. To improve the script from a creative standpoint, focus on weaving subtle plot advancement and character development into casual interactions, enhancing dialogue in reflective scenes for better emotional depth, and ensuring tone shifts serve the narrative rather than disrupt it, ultimately creating a more balanced and engaging story.
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Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (4)
  • Character Complexity - characterArcs: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Character Complexity - characterRelatability: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Character Complexity - characterDialogue: 8.0 → 9.0 +1.0
  • Premise - premiseExecution: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected