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Scene Map 53
# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
2 2
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
3 2
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
4 13
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
5 15
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
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EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
8 18
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
9 19
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
10 23
EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
11 23
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
12 27
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
13 28
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
14 30
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
15 33
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
16 34
EXT OPEN ROAD - GOLDEN HOUR (1990)
17 35
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
18 39
EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
19 41
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
20 42
INT SCHOOL BUS CONTINUOUS
21 44
INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
22 47
EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
23 48
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
24 51
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
25 54
EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
26 57
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
27 58
INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
28 64
EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
29 65
INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
30 66
EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
31 67
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
32 73
EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
33 76
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
34 79
EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
35 80
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
36 81
EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
37 84
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
38 88
EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
39 89
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
40 90
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
41 91
EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
42 94
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
43 97
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
44 100
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
45 104
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY MOMENTS LATER
46 104
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
47 107
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
48 109
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM EVENING
49 113
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM DAY
50 115
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD CONTINUOUS
51 118
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
52 120
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM NIGHT
53 121
INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN Written by P.J. Palmer -- White lines of a distant jet ripple across the sky.
2 2
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Water glides silent and heavy across the spillway into a deep green basin below. At the edge, C.J. HARRIS (10) - skinny in cutoffs and a tank top - his hair in a bowl-cut, sits cross-legged.
3 2
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990) SUPER: 1990 Muffled preaching bleeds through the walls. C.J. (17) sits atop Craig’s desk. Dirty-blonde mullet. Suit
4 13
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - CONTINUOUS C.J. exits the van with Jessie, Erin, Andy and Ryan. CATHY Mom. You can’t stay with us if
5 15
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MOMENTS LATER
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER C.J. steps over his siblings sprawled out, watching TV. Cathy dumps laundry onto the couch. CATHY Nope. Jessie, Erin, help fold.
6 17
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER C.J. steps out onto the porch, past the flooded TV. He watches St. Nick mount his bike. The engine roars. Craig steps back, composes himself, waves St. Nick off. C.J. heads towards Craig.
7 18
EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982) Sunlight flashes off chrome. A pack of Harleys rip below the pines, engines snarling in the soft mountain air. Craig Harris (26), shirtless and lean, leads the pack. His long, thinning hair whips in the wind. Fearless. Alive.
8 18
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME Music blares from a turntable on moving boxes. Lawn chairs for furniture. Cocaine on a plate. Rifles against the wall. The Brady Bunch flickers on a small TV. On the floor: the 5-gallon glass jug filled with coins,
9 19
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS UNCLE MARK (22), long hair and wispy goatee, in an Oakland Raiders t-shirt, lies on a skateboard, his polio-twisted legs dragging behind him. He nods toward REBECCA (30s), sweeping the porch of the
10 23
EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER C.J. wanders down a narrow path to a small clearing where sunbeams fracture across shallow pools. The creek winds around discarded milling machines. He kicks off his flip-flops and steps into the water. Popeye
11 23
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Cathy (26), summer dress, hair pulled back with a bandanna, whistles again with her fingers. C.J. comes running from the woods: C.J.
12 27
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982) C.J., bathed and in his pajamas, locks the back door, closes the blinds, turns off unused lights. Lady follows him. He looks past the blanket door into the -- BEDROOM
13 28
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT Music plays from the El Camino’s radio. C.J. trots with Lady to the dairy truck, peers inside: a gas lantern glows. CRAIG (O.C.) Which hand?
14 30
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT ‘70’s rock plays on the radio. Sugar Ray Leonard boxes on TV. C.J. in a tank top, wipes the tears from his red eyes with the back of his boxing glove. Craig warns C.J.: CRAIG
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990) The office turned youth group meeting room. About twenty TEENS sit scattered on the carpet, loose and tired at the tail end of youth group. Beside the door, a TALENT SHOW SIGN-UP sheet. C.J.’s name is
16 34
EXT OPEN ROAD - GOLDEN HOUR (1990)
EXT. OPEN ROAD - GOLDEN HOUR (1990)
EXT. OPEN ROAD - GOLDEN HOUR (1990) C.J. rides on the back of a Harley through warm air. He leans back. Arms wide. Palm trees emerge along the highway. In the distance, a ferris wheel’s neon glows on the horizon. Overhead, a green highway sign reads: LOS ANGELES.
17 35
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990) The sharp cries of Baby Scotty echo through the dark house. C.J. stirs awake, groans. His mullet at odd angles. He pulls on his jeans, finds coins in the pocket - drops into his glass jug.
18 39
EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER The ranch is a world of silhouettes. The sky shifts from black to deep blue. C.J. trails Craig into a stand of cherry trees. Craig drops behind the low stone wall and motions C.J. to join him. Lady
19 41
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982) C.J. (10), with his bowl-cut combed tight and dressed for school, stands with Jessie (8). They stare at the neighbor’s cottage - Lady and Popeye at their side. Shawn, bounds out of his house in his Boy Scouts uniform with
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INT SCHOOL BUS CONTINUOUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS - CONTINUOUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS - CONTINUOUS Derek, Ezra and Sarah make their way to the backseats where Owen (10), sits. C.J., Shawn and Jessie follow. OWEN
21 44
INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990)
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990) C.J. (17) sleeps, his head against the window. ZACH (O.C.) Mind if I sit? C.J. opens one eye to find Zach (17) standing next to his
22 47
EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982) Bells ring. Doors push open. SCHOOL CHILDREN flood out toward yellow buses. C.J. (10), and Jessie (8), spot Craig across the street on his Harley. St. Nick and Genie share a bike. Uncle Mark waits
23 48
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER The bikers and El Camino pull up near an old school bus painted with rainbows, flowers, crosses: “THE JESUS BUS” C.J. and Jessie hop out with Lady and sprint to the water. Downriver, Pastor Norm (40s), loose white linen, flowing
24 51
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER The El Camino parks near a waterfall thundering into a clear pool, out of sight of the Jesus Bus. NUDISTS soak in the last heat of summer. St. Nick and Genie strip and dive in. Craig follows.
25 54
EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990)
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990) Hidden behind the Log Flume, Owen, Ezra and Derek (all 17) pass an apple made into a bong. C.J. (17) stays focused on pegging his jeans above his red Converse, pretending not to care.
26 57
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982)
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982) Wind blows C.J.’s (10) combed hair. His hand riding the wind out the window of Cathy’s VW. Orange and yellow leaves drift down to blanket the road. Jessie (8) stands on the backseat, her hair in new ribbons.
27 58
INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER A rush of bodies and music and welcome. Handshakes and coffee. Kids darts past. Somebody laughing too loud. C.J. takes in the crowd: Young, happy, clean people. He turns to Cathy.
28 64
EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982)
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982) Fog lifts between the evergreens into the overcast sky above. C.J. waits in his Royal Ranger uniform with Lady and Popeye. Shawn bursts out of his cottage in his Boy Scout uniform and a buck knife strapped to his leg. They run off shoulder-to-
29 65
INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY (1982)
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY (1982) C.J., Jessie and Cathy stand stiff in the front row, hair combed tight, dressed modestly. They try to sing with Craig. Pastor Norm and Janis perform onstage in flowing white linen. Owen plays the tambourine.
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982) A light rain drizzles as fall moves to winter. C.J. and Shawn, in raincoats, pull a huge cedar branch. C.J. Sometimes we drink blood. But
31 67
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990) C.J. (17) in his mullet and Miami Vice-esque jacket, sits in a pew with Owen, Derek and Ezra (all 17, in Cosby sweaters). Ahead of them: Cathy and Jessie with their Aqua-Net hair and the younger Harris kids.
32 73
EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982)
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982) A PERFORMANCE TROUPE in matching overalls and yellow t-shirts hold a sheet painted with: “JESUS SAVES” Craig and a very pregnant Cathy stand with Pastor Norm,
33 76
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Light snow drifts over the partially frozen lake. C.J. and Shawn sit on the narrow dam, bundled in layers. C.J. wears plastic Wonder Bread bags over his socks. Lady and Popeye trail behind.
34 79
EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990)
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990) Fog lifts off the deep lake, drifting through the evergreens. C.J. (17) walks the narrow dam alone. He pulls chalk from his pocket, draws on the concrete like he did as a kid. He stands at the edge, red hi-tops peeking over open space.
35 80
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1990) C.J. jolts awake on the couch, gasping. Disoriented from a deep nap. He looks down. A wet spot spreads across his pants. Across the room, Evelyn, oxygen tubes on, reads catalogues on her pull-out bed.
36 81
EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990)
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990) Silhouettes dance against the waterfall. A massive BONFIRE roars beside the river, throwing wild light across drunk TEENS. Late-80’s music echos off the water. C.J. dances in pegged
37 84
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER Silhouettes of C.J., cowboy hat on, and Owen with keys outside the glass front doors. OWEN (O.C.) It’s the big one.
38 88
EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS Owen storms into the empty parking lot, still buttoning his jeans. His fingers miss the buttonholes. C.J. follows, barefoot, soaked, clutching his clothes and the cowboy hat.
39 89
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN C.J., wearing Owen’s hat closes the door, trying not to wake the house. He takes off the hat. Holds it a moment. Then rests the hat on the nightstand. He turns the brim away from him, toward
40 90
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982) Re-runs play on the T.V. Cathy (26) - long hair, visibly pregnant - clears plates. A thick Bible lies open. Jessie (8) counts as Craig (26) does push-ups in his boxers. C.J (10) pets Popeye, who lies listless in a cardboard box.
41 91
EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS C.J. and Jessie reach the bus stop. Jessie waves to Sarah and Shawn across the road. An over-loaded pick-up truck lumbers between them with a line of cars behind it. The School Bus approaches in the distance. Jessie calls out
42 94
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990) Dozens of TEENS, several still in caps and gowns, rehearse their various talents: ribbon dancing, foam puppets, tambourines. Owen tunes his guitar. Over-tightens a peg. A string snaps.
43 97
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER The sanctuary is packed. The heavy, driving rock of PETRA - “Judas’ Kiss” cranks from the speakers. OWEN (O.S.) (singing)
44 100
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER C.J., still in his disco-suit, steps up to the urinal beside Zach. C.J. pees. ZACH You could’ve warned me.
45 104
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - MOMENTS LATER Craig slams the Youth Ministry van into the driveway. He looks at C.J. in the rearview. CRAIG Go to your room.
46 104
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Andy and Ryan sprawl with Erin, watching THE COSBY SHOW reruns on a small TV. CANNED LAUGHTER fills the room. C.J. enters, still in his disco suit.
47 107
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982) C.J. (10) stands in a shirt and tie, tears streaming down his face. He holds a shoebox labeled: POPEYE. He places the box in a hole under a cross made of sticks surrounded by wildflowers.
48 109
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM EVENING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - EVENING (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - EVENING (1990) C.J. (17), still in his Disco-outfit, stands at the window. He picks up Owen’s hat off the floor, places it back on the night stand. The bedroom door opens behind him. Craig pushes in.
49 113
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - DAY (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - DAY (1990) Through the window: limp balloons. Loose streamers. The remains of a strawberry-topped cake on the picnic table. A crooked banner reads: HAPPY 18TH BIRTHDAY The Harris kids run through the yard. Janis and a few CHURCH
50 115
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - CONTINUOUS The Harris kids inspect the El Camino in the dirt driveway next to several other cars. Craig, Cathy and St. Nick greet Uncle Mark (29) as he sets up his wheelchair. Pastor Norm, Janis and Sheila stand near.
51 118
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990) Sunlight dances through the evergreens onto C.J. sitting on a kitchen stool. Cathy cuts his hair with clippers. Lady rests at his feet. CATHY
52 120
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT (1982) Rain at the windows. Sit-com reruns low on the TV. C.J. (10), in pajamas, sits on the floor with his 5-gallon glass jug. Craig (26) sits near him, back against the couch. From behind the blanket door, Jessie (8) cries.
53 121
INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER C.J. pays for gas and a new Thomas Guide with coins. The ATTENDANT (60s) watches him count. EXT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - MOMENTS LATER C.J. stands at the hood of the El Camino, parked among dozens

SON OF A PREACHER MAN

As his eighteenth birthday nears in a tight-knit evangelical church, a preacher’s son must navigate a domineering father, a panicked first love, and a public scandal at the youth talent show to seize the courage—and the car—to get out to Los Angeles.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Proposition

An unbroken CJ-only perspective with motif-driven intercutting (water, shoes, cross, music) renders evangelical life with granular authenticity and without caricature, building pressure through lived behavior until a quiet, irrevocable exit; adult roles are meaty, awards-caliber turns.

AI Verdict


Synthesis Where readers agree and split
7.7

The script earns a championable recommendation for its singular authorial voice and formal discipline, contingent on targeted revisions that shore up mid-act traction and relationship calibration.

Readers read as Specialty1 Prestige4 Drama Coming of age

A prestige coming-of-age drama that trades conventional catharsis for cumulative emotional pressure, using a strict single-consciousness POV and recurring visual motifs to explore religious trauma, queer longing, and the inevitability of failure.

Readers split on the secondary lane, with two reading specialty, one prestige, one festival-arthouse, and one reporting none; the split traces to how the script’s deliberate restraint registers against market expectations for pacing and resolution.

Would readers champion it?
Not yetNot yetReaders wouldn’t actively push for it.
WeaklyWeaklyMentioned, but no real push behind it.
ModeratelyModeratelyMentioned favorably to the right buyer.
StronglyStronglyActively championed across their network.
DeepSeekModeratelyGrokModeratelyClaudeStronglyGPT5StronglyGeminiStrongly
How much rewrite does it need?
Start from scratchStart from scratchPremise or core engine isn’t working. Page-one rebuild.
Structural rewriteStructural rewriteRe-architecting acts and arcs. Multi-month effort.
Targeted rewriteTargeted rewriteSpecific scenes or threads need rework. ~1 month.
Just polishJust polishLines and pacing tweaks. A few weeks.
ClaudeTargeted rewriteDeepSeekTargeted rewriteGPT5Targeted rewriteGrokTargeted rewriteGeminiJust polish
How distinctive is the voice?
GenericGenericReads like other scripts in the genre.
EmergingEmergingHints of a distinctive voice, not yet locked in.
DistinctiveDistinctiveA clear, recognizable authorial voice.
One-of-a-kindOne-of-a-kindA voice that couldn’t be anyone else’s.
DeepSeekDistinctiveGPT5DistinctiveGrokDistinctiveClaudeOne-of-a-kindGeminiOne-of-a-kind

On the score: The score sits between two verdicts — small changes in either direction could flip it.

What's working 3 of 5 readers agree

The motif system and strict single-consciousness POV discipline form a cohesive, championable asset that anchors the script’s festival-prestige positioning.

What's blocking 3 of 5 readers agree

The middle-act pressure deficit in the 1990 timeline, where sequences accumulate mood without escalating causal consequence, remains the primary blocker to a higher advocacy call.

Why not lower

The ensemble agrees that the script’s formal discipline, motif coherence, and strict POV rule provide a defensible artistic floor that holds it clearly above competent craft.

Why not higher

Four models agree that mid-act pressure deficits, Owen’s under-calibrated rupture, and sequence handoff drift prevent the read from achieving the sustained momentum required for the highest tier.

Fix-first · Protect-while-fixing · Reader splits · Quick credibility wins
Rewrite map

The ensemble converges on a targeted rewrite that must restore active causal pressure to the 1990 timeline and calibrate Owen’s interiority without compromising the strict POV and motif architecture that anchor the script’s festival-prestige positioning.

Readers read as Specialty1 Prestige4

Fix first 2
1990 timeline lacks active causal pressure

The middle stretch of the 1990 timeline accumulates mood and motif without escalating external consequence, leaving the final departure feeling episodic rather than inevitable.

Root cause

The script places the full burden of causal pressure on C.J.'s internal state rather than on a tightening external situation or clear sequence handoffs.

Owen’s rupture lacks calibrated interiority

Owen’s pivot from intimacy to homophobic rejection lands as a behavioral event rather than a specific, tragic loss, weakening the emotional foundation of the 1990 storyline.

Root cause

The script withholds Owen’s interior state completely, relying on deflection and type-statements instead of a single CJ-observable beat of genuine fear or desire.

Protect while fixing 1
Strict CJ-only POV and motif architecture

Addressing the 1990 pressure deficit or Owen’s opacity risks adding explanatory dialogue, off-POV beats, or new scenes that would break the subjective constraint and flatten the motif system’s emotional resonance.

Reader splits 1
Primary pressure deficit location Consequential
Side A

The 1990 timeline lacks causal escalation and active pursuit, causing momentum to flag before the climax.

Side B

The 1982 timeline functions as atmospheric texture without generating scene-level stakes that actively complicate the present story.

Quick credibility wins 1
Standardize formatting and trim over-direction
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Romance 25% Comedy 15% Fantasy 10% Action 10% Crime 5%

Setting: 1982 and 1990, Harris farm house, Sierra City, California, and various outdoor settings

Themes: Religious Dogma and Spiritual Seeking, Forbidden Desire and Self-Acceptance, Family Dysfunction and the Search for Stability, Escape and the Pursuit of Dreams, The Failure of Authority and Institutions, The Fluidity of Performance and Identity, Loss and Grief

Conflict & Stakes: C.J.'s struggle with his identity, familial expectations, and societal norms, with the stakes being his emotional well-being and future aspirations.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The juxtaposition of a rural upbringing with the exploration of LGBTQ+ identity in a conservative family setting.
  • Plot Twist: C.J.'s unexpected confrontation with his father's homophobia and the emotional fallout that follows.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of childhood memories and dreams as a narrative device to explore C.J.'s internal struggles.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between the idyllic rural landscape and the chaotic family dynamics creates a rich backdrop for the story.

Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Stand by Me, Boyhood, The Glass Castle, A Streetcar Named Desire, The Catcher in the Rye, This Is Us, Moonlight, The Fault in Our Stars

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

Readers graded as Specialty1 Prestige4
Claude GPT5 Gemini DeepSeek Grok Average spread Row tint: weak mid strong excellent
Premise i
7.8
Plot i
6.6
Structure i
7.6
Character i
8.0
Dialogue i
7.2
Tone / Voice i
8.4
Theme i
8.4
Marketability i
7.4
🎯 Your Top Priorities

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

You have more than one meaningful lever.

Improving Conflict (Script Level) and Structure (Script Level) will have the biggest impact on your overall score next draft.

1. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.2
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.5 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~1,745 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
2. Structure (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Structure (Script Level) score: 7.7
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.35 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~1,141 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Structure (Script Level) by about +0.35 in one rewrite.
3. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 8.0
Typical rewrite gain: +0.28 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~1,239 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.28 in one rewrite.
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Skills Worth Developing

These have high model impact but rarely improve through rewrites alone — they're craft investments. Studying these areas through courses, mentorship, or focused reading could unlock gains that a normal rewrite won't.

Pacing Scene Level 1.4× leverage

Strong model leverage, but writers at your level typically only gain +0.15 per rewrite. (Your score: 8.1)

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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.89
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script creatively, focus on deepening the character arcs of secondary figures like Owen and Craig to better explore their internal conflicts and motivations, which will enhance emotional depth and thematic resonance. Additionally, refine transitions between timelines and emotional beats to ensure smoother narrative flow and greater audience engagement, drawing from inspirations like 'Moonlight' for nuanced relationship dynamics.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
To refine 'Son of a Preacher Man,' prioritize strengthening foreshadowing for key character exits to build emotional depth and prevent audience disorientation, while addressing pacing issues through tighter scene transitions and more reflective moments for C.J. This will enhance the script's craft, making the themes of identity and loss more resonant and the narrative flow more engaging, ultimately elevating the story's emotional impact.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights opportunities to enrich the script by delving deeper into the emotional complexities and internal conflicts of key figures like C.J., Craig, and Owen. By incorporating more scenes that explore their backstories, vulnerabilities, and relational dynamics—such as C.J.'s artistic expressions and Craig's hidden insecurities—the narrative can achieve greater depth and authenticity. This approach will strengthen character arcs, enhance thematic resonance, and create more engaging, relatable storytelling that elevates the overall emotional impact and avoids stereotypical portrayals.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong but could be elevated by diversifying the emotional range with more balanced moments of joy and hope, ensuring smoother transitions between high-intensity scenes, and deepening character empathy through subtle, personal revelations. This would reduce emotional monotony, enhance audience connection, and provide a more nuanced exploration of C.J.'s journey, making the story more dynamic and resonant from a craft perspective.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script's analysis reveals a strong focus on C.J.'s internal and external goals, driving a compelling character arc, but to enhance craft, consider tightening the philosophical conflict resolution by adding more nuanced interactions that build tension and make C.J.'s journey to self-acceptance feel more organic and less rushed, ensuring emotional beats land with greater impact and authenticity.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's creative impact, focus on deepening C.J.'s character arc by incorporating more subtle, introspective moments that highlight his internal conflict, particularly around themes of identity and desire. This would balance the heavy religious and familial elements, preventing them from overwhelming the narrative, and enhance emotional authenticity; consider refining dialogue and scenes to show gradual self-acceptance, making the story more nuanced and resonant for audiences.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's inconsistencies in character behavior, such as abrupt shifts in Owen's and Craig's attitudes, weaken emotional authenticity and character arcs. To improve, focus on building gradual motivations for changes, resolving plot holes like St. Nick's untimely appearance, and eliminating redundant elements, such as repeated Hollywood dreams, to create a tighter, more cohesive narrative that enhances audience immersion and thematic depth.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's introspective and poetic voice is a strength, capturing emotional depth and thematic complexity, but to improve, focus on balancing this melancholy tone with more varied pacing and moments of levity or conflict to prevent audience fatigue and enhance engagement. Ensure that symbolic elements, like the chalk drawings and voice-overs, are tightly integrated with plot progression to avoid overshadowing character arcs, making C.J.'s journey more compelling and universally relatable.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's emotional depth and character dynamics are strong, but to elevate it creatively, focus on deepening character internal conflicts and motivations, refining dialogue for more subtext and authenticity, and enhancing thematic elements through better integration of motifs and symbols. By doing so, the story will achieve greater emotional resonance, making it more engaging and impactful for audiences in the independent film space.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world building is a strong asset, effectively using rural 1980s settings and motifs like water and isolation to mirror C.J.'s emotional journey, but to elevate craft, focus on refining transitions between time jumps for smoother narrative flow and ensure symbolic elements consistently reinforce themes of identity and loss, avoiding any potential dilution of the POV-centric structure to heighten immersion and emotional impact.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its deep emotional resonance and introspective tone, particularly through CJ's POV, but it risks feeling static in reflective scenes due to low conflict and slow pacing. To enhance craft, focus on subtly integrating micro-moments of tension or foreshadowing in nostalgic sequences to maintain momentum without altering the core thematic integrity, ensuring a more engaging narrative flow while preserving the script's artistic depth.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (0)

No improvements detected

Areas to Review (2)
  • Emotional Impact: 8.5 → 8.0 -0.5
  • Character Complexity: 7.9 → 7.6 -0.3