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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL NIGHT
2 2
EXT BACKYARD NIGHT
3 3
INT KITCHEN MORNING
4 6
INT COLORADO PARKS AND WILDLIFE - SATELLITE OFFICE DAY
5 8
EXT BACKYARD – DAY
6 9
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL DAY
7 11
EXT MITCHELL HOUSE DAY
8 12
EXT CANAL TRAIL DAY
9 14
INT POLICE DEPARTMENT - BULLPEN DAY
10 17
EXT LIBRARY DAY
11 20
INT MITCHELL HOUSE - KITCHEN NIGHT
12 23
INT KITCHEN MORNING
13 25
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL DAY
14 27
INT DENVER WATER COMPANY DAY
15 28
INT OFFICE DAY
16 30
EXT DENVER WATER - PARKING LOT DAY
17 32
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL DAY
18 34
EXT CANAL CORRIDOR - BRUSH LINE CONTINUOUS
19 36
INT ROCKY MOUNTAIN ARSENAL - FIELD OFFICE DAY
20 37
INT RUSS’S TRUCK DAY
21 38
EXT WILDLIFE REFUGE DAY
22 39
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL – DAY
23 42
EXT MITCHELL HOUSE - BACK PORCH NIGHT
24 45
INT GLOVER'S MANSION - LIVING ROOM NIGHT
25 47
INT CPW OFFICE NIGHT
26 49
EXT BACKYARD – NIGHT
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL NIGHT
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL - NIGHT
HIGH LINE "Follow the Water" (Pilot) Written by Dane Hooks
2 2
EXT BACKYARD NIGHT
EXT. BACKYARD - NIGHT
EXT. BACKYARD - NIGHT A vast, manicured backyard stretches into darkness -- too big, too quiet. At the back door sits an AGED COCKER SPANIEL, cloudy-eyed, ribs faintly visible beneath thinning fur.
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INT KITCHEN MORNING
INT. KITCHEN - MORNING
INT. KITCHEN - MORNING Early light slips through half-open blinds, striping the kitchen in pale gold. The house is old. Lived-in. MATT LOCKWOOD (40s) stands at the stove in a faded T-shirt,
4 6
INT COLORADO PARKS AND WILDLIFE - SATELLITE OFFICE DAY
INT. COLORADO PARKS AND WILDLIFE - SATELLITE OFFICE - DAY
INT. COLORADO PARKS AND WILDLIFE - SATELLITE OFFICE - DAY A small, utilitarian office. Matt sits alone at a metal desk near a window that looks out on scrubland and distant cottonwoods. He glances at a corkboard on the wall --
5 8
EXT BACKYARD – DAY
EXT. BACKYARD – DAY
EXT. BACKYARD – DAY A pristine backyard under clear Colorado sunlight. Wind chimes CLICK softly, cheerful and out of place. Matt steps through the open side gate and stops. The grass near the back fence is disturbed -- not torn up.
6 9
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL - DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL - DAY The dry canal -- a scar cutting through the landscape. On either side -- backyards give way to brush, cottonwoods, and scrub. Civilization thins out by the footstep.
7 11
EXT MITCHELL HOUSE DAY
EXT. MITCHELL HOUSE - DAY (FLASHBACK)
EXT. MITCHELL HOUSE - DAY (FLASHBACK) A modest, sun-warmed house. Rose-yellow brick. Red asphalt shingles. The canal churns through backyards thick with brush and tall grass -- nature still winning.
8 12
EXT CANAL TRAIL DAY
EXT. CANAL TRAIL - DAY
EXT. CANAL TRAIL - DAY A dirt track hugs the rushing water. Matt and Artie jog past a red barn. Past acres of scraped land. Matt slows, catching his breath.
9 14
INT POLICE DEPARTMENT - BULLPEN DAY
INT. POLICE DEPARTMENT - BULLPEN - DAY
INT. POLICE DEPARTMENT - BULLPEN - DAY Glass walls. Framed commendations. A coffee machine hums. OFFICER KATE LEMON (30s) stands at a whiteboard, mid- conversation with a UNIFORMED OFFICER, jotting notes with practiced efficiency.
10 17
EXT LIBRARY DAY
EXT. LIBRARY - DAY
EXT. LIBRARY - DAY Blue sky. Clean air. A brand-new brick-and-glass library gleams in the sun like a monument to good intentions. A yellow ribbon stretches across the front steps. A small CROWD gathers -- donors, city council members,
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INT MITCHELL HOUSE - KITCHEN NIGHT
INT. MITCHELL HOUSE - KITCHEN - NIGHT
INT. MITCHELL HOUSE - KITCHEN - NIGHT Matt enters with a pizza box, cardboard bowed from heat. He sets it on the old kitchen table. Sean is already there, hoodie cinched tight, restless. Bruce lowers himself into a chair opposite Sean -- careful,
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INT KITCHEN MORNING
INT. KITCHEN - MORNING
INT. KITCHEN - MORNING Early light filters through the blinds, pale and brittle. Matt stands at the sink, half-awake. He turns the faucet. Water pours into a glass.
13 25
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL - DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL - DAY The ROCKY MOUNTAIN RANGE looms in the distance -- jagged, indifferent. Closer in -- The High Line Canal runs parallel to the trail.
14 27
INT DENVER WATER COMPANY DAY
INT. DENVER WATER COMPANY - DAY
INT. DENVER WATER COMPANY - DAY A Romanesque rotunda, all pale stone and civic pride. At its center: a fountain -- water spilling endlessly, indifferent to scarcity. Matt stands beside it, still, watching the water cycle back
15 28
INT OFFICE DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY
INT. OFFICE - DAY The Rocky Mountains sit perfectly framed in the windows -- Less like nature, more like branding. WALTER DENT (50s) -- silver-haired, composed, expensive in a way that never announces itself -- sits behind an immaculate
16 30
EXT DENVER WATER - PARKING LOT DAY
EXT. DENVER WATER - PARKING LOT - DAY
EXT. DENVER WATER - PARKING LOT - DAY The Denver Water Building rises in glass and steel -- clean, reflective, impenetrable. Matt exits through the front doors, phone clenched in his
17 32
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL - DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL - DAY Blue sky. Clean light. A day meant for joggers. There are none. Police tape flutters between cottonwoods -- obscene against
18 34
EXT CANAL CORRIDOR - BRUSH LINE CONTINUOUS
EXT. CANAL CORRIDOR - BRUSH LINE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. CANAL CORRIDOR - BRUSH LINE - CONTINUOUS The canal tightens. Matt moves along the edge. Lemon follows a few steps back. The air feels heavier.
19 36
INT ROCKY MOUNTAIN ARSENAL - FIELD OFFICE DAY
INT. ROCKY MOUNTAIN ARSENAL - FIELD OFFICE - DAY
INT. ROCKY MOUNTAIN ARSENAL - FIELD OFFICE - DAY A modest office dressed up to feel official. Government-issue furniture. Fluorescent hum. No windows. RUSS MCCARTHY (50s) sits behind his desk -- thick neck, heavy hands, posture of someone who’s been told when to use force
20 37
INT RUSS’S TRUCK DAY
INT. RUSS’S TRUCK - DAY
INT. RUSS’S TRUCK - DAY A government pickup cuts through open prairie -- wind rippling the grass in long, anxious waves. Russ drives with steady hands. Matt watches the land slide past.
21 38
EXT WILDLIFE REFUGE DAY
EXT. WILDLIFE REFUGE - DAY
EXT. WILDLIFE REFUGE - DAY Matt and Russ stand beside the truck. The quiet presses in. No birds. No insects.
22 39
EXT HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL – DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL – DAY
EXT. HIGH LINE CANAL TRAIL – DAY The High Line Canal stretches ahead -- dry, cracked earth below the trail, cottonwoods leaning inward like they’re listening. Sean pedals his bike along the path, hoodie flapping lightly
23 42
EXT MITCHELL HOUSE - BACK PORCH NIGHT
EXT. MITCHELL HOUSE - BACK PORCH - NIGHT
EXT. MITCHELL HOUSE - BACK PORCH - NIGHT Bruce sits alone on the back porch, wrapped in a light jacket despite the mild air. A rocking chair. Slow. Rhythmic. Beyond him, the High Line Canal cuts through the landscape --
24 45
INT GLOVER'S MANSION - LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. GLOVER'S MANSION - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. GLOVER'S MANSION - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT A vast, immaculate living room. Stone. Glass. Clean lines softened by massive framed Western landscapes -- sweeping plains, river valleys, untouched mountains. America before fences.
25 47
INT CPW OFFICE NIGHT
INT. CPW OFFICE - NIGHT
INT. CPW OFFICE - NIGHT Matt sits alone at his desk, lit by the glow of a computer monitor. Around him -- maps everywhere. Topographicals taped to walls.
26 49
EXT BACKYARD – NIGHT
EXT. BACKYARD – NIGHT
EXT. BACKYARD – NIGHT A wealthy, tastefully restrained backyard. Stone. Wood. Soft lighting designed to suggest nature without ever allowing it in. At the far end -- A HOT TUB steams gently beneath the open

High Line

After multiple brutal attacks along a desiccated canal, a single dad and wildlife officer pieces together a map that points to a planned land grab—if he can’t stop the developer’s plan, the town will be paved over and the predators will be used as cover.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The script's unique selling proposition is its innovative fusion of environmental thriller, neo-western, and conspiracy drama. Unlike typical creature features, it uses the mountain lion as a symptom of larger systemic manipulation—water being weaponized to clear land for development. The dry canal becomes both literal setting and powerful metaphor for scarcity, control, and what happens when natural systems are disrupted. This elevates it beyond simple predator horror into a sophisticated commentary on resource wars and human encroachment.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
Claude
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.1
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve the script's craft, focus on clarifying the mechanics of the human-animal conspiracy, such as providing explicit causal links between water diversion and mountain lion behavior, to strengthen the mystery's foundation and avoid audience confusion. Additionally, deepen secondary character arcs, like Bruce's dementia and Sean's personal stakes, by integrating them more actively into the plot for better emotional resonance and pacing, ensuring the story's themes of environmental and familial tension are more cohesively explored.
For Executives:
The script has solid value as an atmospheric eco-thriller with a timely conspiracy angle, appealing to audiences who enjoy shows like Yellowstone or True Detective, and it offers strong visual hooks for production. However, risks include potential viewer disengagement from vague antagonist mechanics and underdeveloped characters, which could weaken the series arc and make it feel derivative if not refined; market perception is moderately positive but hinges on polishing these elements to stand out in a crowded genre.
Story Facts
Genres:
Thriller 50% Horror 30% Drama 30% Crime 20% Action 15%

Setting: Contemporary, High Line Canal and surrounding suburban areas in Colorado

Themes: Exploitation of Nature and Resources, Nature's Retaliation/Consequence, Corruption and Power/Human Will vs. Natural Forces, Humanity vs. Nature, Memory and Trauma, Family Dynamics and Generational Disconnect

Conflict & Stakes: The primary conflict revolves around the threat posed by a mountain lion and the environmental issues surrounding the dry High Line Canal, with stakes including public safety, personal loss, and the investigation into potential human interference.

Mood: Tense and suspenseful, with underlying themes of melancholy and reflection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The juxtaposition of suburban life with the lurking threat of wildlife, particularly the mountain lion.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Glover Thompson's involvement in the environmental manipulation and the connection to the mountain lion attacks.
  • Distinctive Setting: The High Line Canal serves as a central, symbolic location representing both environmental neglect and the intersection of human and wildlife territories.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay explores the consequences of water scarcity and its impact on wildlife behavior, providing a fresh perspective on environmental issues.

Comparable Scripts: The River Wild, A Quiet Place, The Call of the Wild, The Road, Stranger Things, The Girl with All the Gifts, The Last of Us, Into the Wild, The Edge

🎯 Your Top Priorities

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

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Improving Theme (Script Level) and Visual Impact (Script Level) will have the biggest impact on your overall score next draft.

1. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 7.8
Expected gain: ~5% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Theme (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~3,464 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
2. Visual Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Visual Impact (Script Level) score: 7.3
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Visual Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~4,148 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Visual Impact (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
3. Premise (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Premise (Script Level) score: 7.9
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Premise (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~1,875 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Premise (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.54
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script from a creative standpoint, prioritize deepening the character arcs of supporting figures like Bruce and Sean by incorporating flashbacks and subplots that reveal their backstories, which will add emotional layers and make family dynamics more compelling. Additionally, refine pacing by streamlining exposition-heavy scenes through organic integration into dialogue and action, ensuring a tighter narrative flow that maintains tension and enhances overall engagement.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script excels in building atmosphere and character depth, particularly through its environmental metaphors and family dynamics, but to enhance its craft, focus on streamlining pacing by reducing exposition and integrating more action-driven sequences. Deepening the motivations of secondary characters like Glover Thompson will create stronger conflicts and a more cohesive narrative, ensuring that the story's tension and themes are delivered with greater impact and clarity.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights opportunities to strengthen the script by deepening emotional arcs and relationships, particularly for Sean, whose adolescent struggles could be more nuanced to reflect universal themes of independence and family conflict. Enhancing Matt's military backstory and the mountain lion's symbolic role will add layers of tension and thematic resonance, ensuring characters drive the narrative with compelling motivations and growth, ultimately elevating the story's emotional impact and audience connection.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong in suspense and empathy for the protagonist, but it could be enhanced by incorporating more varied emotional tones, such as moments of genuine joy or humor, to balance the heavy focus on fear and tension. Addressing emotional fatigue in high-intensity sequences and deepening secondary character development will create a more nuanced, engaging narrative that avoids monotony and strengthens audience investment, ultimately making the story more impactful and memorable.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights a strong foundation in Matt's internal and external goals, driving character development and thematic depth, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on integrating the philosophical conflict more seamlessly into everyday scenes and dialogue. This will enhance emotional resonance and ensure that the themes of progress versus preservation feel organic rather than didactic, allowing for a more nuanced exploration of Matt's evolution and making the narrative more compelling and relatable.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strong thematic foundation on environmental exploitation can be enhanced by deepening character arcs to better mirror the ecological themes, such as expanding Matt's trauma to symbolize broader human consequences, ensuring that personal and familial conflicts feel organically tied to the larger narrative. This would add emotional resonance and avoid potential preachiness, making the story more engaging and nuanced for viewers.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's inconsistencies, such as character behaviors not aligning with their established traits and unresolved plot elements, disrupt immersion and authenticity. To enhance the narrative, focus on grounding character actions in consistent motivations, filling logical gaps like the human-animal coordination, and streamlining redundant elements to create a tighter, more engaging story that better serves the environmental thriller theme.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The writer's voice excels in building atmosphere and tension through vivid, sensory-rich descriptions, which effectively underscore themes of environmental loss and human vulnerability. To enhance the script, consider varying the pacing in descriptive passages to avoid overwhelming the narrative, and deepen character dialogues to reveal more internal conflicts, ensuring that the subtext not only supports but also propels the plot forward, making the story more dynamic and emotionally compelling.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative craft, focus on weaving deeper subtext into dialogues to reveal unspoken emotions, refining pacing to build and sustain tension more effectively, and expanding character development to explore internal conflicts and motivations. By addressing these areas, the writer can create a more immersive, emotionally resonant narrative that leverages the script's strong atmospheric elements and thematic depth for greater impact.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building is a strong asset, effectively using the dry canal and contrasting environments to build tension and thematic depth, but to enhance creative craft, focus on integrating these elements more dynamically with character development. For instance, ensure that environmental motifs like the canal evolve alongside characters' emotional arcs, avoiding static symbolism that could feel repetitive, and use cultural and societal details to add layers of conflict and growth, making the story more engaging and less predictable.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its tense, suspenseful build-up and emotional depth, but to elevate it, focus on weaving character-driven emotional moments more tightly into plot progression for better cohesion. Additionally, enhance dialogue in reflective scenes to maintain consistency and depth, ensuring that atmospheric elements complement rather than overshadow interpersonal dynamics, ultimately creating a more balanced and engaging narrative.
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