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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
Stone Age
2 3
INT MILES’ LAB – DAY
3 4
INT SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP – MORNING
4 7
INT SEATTLE AIRPORT – DAY
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INT RIDESHARE – MOVING – DAY
6 9
INT MILES’ LAB – DAY
7 12
INT MILES’ APARTMENT – DAY
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INT SEATTLE BAR – NIGHT
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INT SEATTLE BAR – CONTINUOUS
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INT MILES’ LAB – NIGHT
11 24
EXT STONE AGE – DAY
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EXT STONE AGE – MOVING – DAY
13 30
EXT FOREST PATH – DAY
14 30
EXT CLAN CAMP DAY
15 34
EXT CLAN CAMP LATER
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EXT CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
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EXT CLAN CAMP LATER
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EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
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EXT CLAN CAMP – DAY
20 48
EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
21 51
EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
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EXT EDGE OF CAMP – DAY
23 55
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
24 57
EXT GEYSER FIELD LATER
25 59
EXT CLAN CAMP – DAY
26 61
EXT EDGE OF CAMP NIGHT
27 64
EXT CANYON WALL – DAY
28 68
EXT CANYON WALL – DUSK
29 70
EXT COASTAL FOREST RIDGE – DUSK
30 71
EXT RIVAL ENCAMPMENT – CONTINUOUS
31 75
EXT CAMP NIGHT
32 75
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
33 78
EXT CAMP LATER
34 78
EXT CAMP DAY
35 79
EXT CAMP EDGE DAY
36 80
EXT OPEN LANDSCAPE DAY
37 80
EXT ROCKY PATH DAY
38 81
EXT SMALL FIRE MOMENTS LATER
39 83
EXT SMALL FIRE NIGHT
40 86
EXT RIVER CROSSING DAY
41 88
EXT RIDGE DAY
42 89
EXT SHORELINE DAY
43 91
EXT UNEVEN TERRAIN DAY
44 92
EXT RIVERBANK – DAY
45 94
EXT CLAN CAMP DAY
46 96
EXT CLAN CAMP MOMENTS LATER
47 96
EXT CLAN CAMP NIGHT
48 97
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
49 100
EXT CLAN CAMP NIGHT
50 101
EXT RIDGE OVERLOOKING CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
51 102
EXT CAMP CONTINUOUS
52 103
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
53 109
INT MILES’ LAB DAY
54 110
EXT CITY STREET DAY
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EXT SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
Stone Age
Stone Age
Stone Age written by Grant Popielarz Address: 8201-102 Avenue, Peace River, Alberta, Canada, T8S 1N2 Phone: (780) 219-4626
2 3
INT MILES’ LAB – DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB – DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB – DAY Bright, cluttered, alive with equipment. MILES (20's), long sleeved button up shirt, chinos, hair unkept, magnifying glasses. He is already mid-experiment. Wires everywhere. Improvised
3 4
INT SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP – MORNING
INT. SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP – MORNING
INT. SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP – MORNING Busy. Warm. Espresso machines hiss. TREVOR (20's)—jeans, T-shirt, leather jacket — steps up to the counter. He is a wreck. Dark circles under his eyes. BARISTA
4 7
INT SEATTLE AIRPORT – DAY
INT. SEATTLE AIRPORT – DAY
INT. SEATTLE AIRPORT – DAY Crowds moving. Announcements overhead. ZOE (20s), Fashionable and confident. steps into frame—carry- on, backpack. Practical, not overpacked. She pauses just inside the terminal and takes it in. Not with wide-eyed awe—
5 8
INT RIDESHARE – MOVING – DAY
INT. RIDESHARE – MOVING – DAY
INT. RIDESHARE – MOVING – DAY The city slides by outside. Zoe watches. Not glued to her phone—actually observing the unfamiliar streets, the people, neighborhoods shifting The DRIVER glances in the mirror.
6 9
INT MILES’ LAB – DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB – DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB – DAY The lab hums. Controlled chaos. Miles is mid-adjustment on the machine. Trevor steps in—takes it all in. The weird invention shelf. Wires. Noise.
7 12
INT MILES’ APARTMENT – DAY
INT. MILES’ APARTMENT – DAY
INT. MILES’ APARTMENT – DAY Quieter than the lab. Still cluttered—but more contained. Miles stands in front of a mirror. Still. Thinking. On the table beside him sits a notepad. ON THE NOTEPAD
8 14
INT SEATTLE BAR – NIGHT
INT. SEATTLE BAR – NIGHT
INT. SEATTLE BAR – NIGHT Lively. Warm. Music under everything—not overpowering. Trevor and Sophie sit at a small table. Trevor scans the room, checking his watch. TREVOR
9 19
INT SEATTLE BAR – CONTINUOUS
INT. SEATTLE BAR – CONTINUOUS
INT. SEATTLE BAR – CONTINUOUS Back at table. Sweat on Miles’ brow. ZOE So what do you actually build? Trevor braces.
10 20
INT MILES’ LAB – NIGHT
INT. MILES’ LAB – NIGHT
INT. MILES’ LAB – NIGHT The door opens. Lights flick on. The machine sits in the center of the room—quiet, but imposing. Zoe steps in first. She takes it in. ZOE
11 24
EXT STONE AGE – DAY
EXT. STONE AGE – DAY
EXT. STONE AGE – DAY Wind. Open sky. A stillness that feels… wrong. Miles lies on the ground. Trevor, Sophie, and Zoe are scattered nearby. Trevor groans. He rolls over and sits up, clutching his head.
12 29
EXT STONE AGE – MOVING – DAY
EXT. STONE AGE – MOVING – DAY
EXT. STONE AGE – MOVING – DAY The Clan begins to move. They motion for the group to follow. Trevor plants his feet. TREVOR Are we going with them?
13 30
EXT FOREST PATH – DAY
EXT. FOREST PATH – DAY
EXT. FOREST PATH – DAY The terrain is brutal. Massive ferns and ancient roots snag at their modern shoes. Trevor trips hard on a thick, mossy root— TREVOR
14 30
EXT CLAN CAMP DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP - DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP - DAY They crest a ridge and stop. The camp below is a marvel in primitive engineering. It’s a natural amphitheater of stone but modified: animal skins are
15 34
EXT CLAN CAMP LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - LATER The sun is lower. A CLAN MEMBER tries to retrieve a piece of roasting meat, but it slips. It drops into the white-hot coals. CLAN MEMBER
16 34
EXT CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP – NIGHT Deep darkness beyond the firelight. The Clan gathers around the central hearth while Miles crouches beside it, studying the weak, uneven flame with visible disappointment.
17 39
EXT CLAN CAMP LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - LATER Firelight flickers against the stone walls. The camp has settled into a low hum of voices and wind. Occasional animal sounds echo in the distance. The group stands awkwardly in the center. No one has told
18 42
EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER The camp sleeps beneath a cold, star-heavy sky. Only the central fire still burns — low embers glowing red. Trevor lies awake in the shared fur pile, staring upward. A heavy Clan arm is draped across his chest again.
19 46
EXT CLAN CAMP – DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP – DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP – DAY Early light. Trevor’s eyes snap open. He hasn’t slept. He’s still wedged tightly between two Clan members. One
20 48
EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER The camp is alive with activity. A Clan member feeds wood into the central fire. The travelers sit nearby, watching. Ena sits across from Zoe. Zoe gestures—trying to bridge the gap.
21 51
EXT CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP – LATER The travelers sit with the Clan. Ena studies Zoe—something new catches her eye. Her gaze moves to Zoe’s legs. Smooth. Ena reaches out, lightly touching Zoe's skin. She is genuinely surprised.
22 52
EXT EDGE OF CAMP – DAY
EXT. EDGE OF CAMP – DAY
EXT. EDGE OF CAMP – DAY Just outside the main activity. Close enough to see the Clan; far enough to talk. They sit in an uneven circle, none of them fully comfortable. TREVOR
23 55
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY A desolate, rocky plateau. Steam vents hiss from the earth. In the center, a large, bubbling pool of grey-blue water. A construction site. Miles is a blur of movement, his clothes stained with soot and clay.
24 57
EXT GEYSER FIELD LATER
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - LATER
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - LATER The structure is complete. It looks like a nightmare version of Miles’s machine. Bone, hide, and gourds, all centered around the geyser. Pressure builds beneath the makeshift machine. Heat is
25 59
EXT CLAN CAMP – DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP – DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP – DAY The camp hums with activity. Marked piles of stone. Color-coded bundles. Organized work groups. Nearby, Zoe kneels beside Ena and several Clan women.
26 61
EXT EDGE OF CAMP NIGHT
EXT. EDGE OF CAMP - NIGHT
EXT. EDGE OF CAMP - NIGHT A small fire. Quieter than usual. The Clan is further off— distant shapes, low voices. Miles sits alone, turning a piece of broken stone in his hand. Zoe approaches, stopping a few feet away.
27 64
EXT CANYON WALL – DAY
EXT. CANYON WALL – DAY
EXT. CANYON WALL – DAY A narrow canyon carved through ancient stone. Wind whistles through jagged openings overhead. The Clan moves through the canyon gathering materials: flint, clay, copper-rich rocks.
28 68
EXT CANYON WALL – DUSK
EXT. CANYON WALL – DUSK
EXT. CANYON WALL – DUSK Low sunlight washes across the stone. The Clan gathers farther down the canyon, distant voices echoing softly. Miles remains near the wall alone.
29 70
EXT COASTAL FOREST RIDGE – DUSK
EXT. COASTAL FOREST RIDGE – DUSK
EXT. COASTAL FOREST RIDGE – DUSK Wind whispers through towering prehistoric pines. The travelers move carefully along a narrow ridge. Trevor struggles uphill carrying a bundle of supplies made entirely from things he deeply resents.
30 71
EXT RIVAL ENCAMPMENT – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RIVAL ENCAMPMENT – CONTINUOUS
EXT. RIVAL ENCAMPMENT – CONTINUOUS The Clan emerges onto a rocky overlook. Below them— The rival clan gathered around a massive bonfire.
31 75
EXT CAMP NIGHT
EXT. CAMP - NIGHT
EXT. CAMP - NIGHT The weary group stumbles into camp. Soot covered and in disarray. Several clan members gather around them. Touching their damaged clothing.
32 75
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY Miles kneels near the charred remnants of the failed structure. He studies a broken piece of stone with a clinical intensity.
33 78
EXT CAMP LATER
EXT. CAMP - LATER
EXT. CAMP - LATER The drawing in the dirt remains: a rough shoreline representing the "Big Water." The travelers stand around it like a boardroom table. The Clan watches from the periphery. Trevor paces.
34 78
EXT CAMP DAY
EXT. CAMP - DAY
EXT. CAMP - DAY The camp is in motion. Sophie organizes bundles of dried meat. The Clan gathers supplies, wrapping them in heavy furs.
35 79
EXT CAMP EDGE DAY
EXT. CAMP EDGE - DAY
EXT. CAMP EDGE - DAY The group stands ready at the perimeter. Ena, Tala, and a few others join them, while the rest of the Clan stays behind to guard the hearth. SOPHIE
36 80
EXT OPEN LANDSCAPE DAY
EXT. OPEN LANDSCAPE - DAY
EXT. OPEN LANDSCAPE - DAY The group moves across uneven, prehistoric ground. A loose line forms. Trevor struggles with his footing, trips, and barely catches himself. TREVOR
37 80
EXT ROCKY PATH DAY
EXT. ROCKY PATH - DAY
EXT. ROCKY PATH - DAY The group slows as they navigate a dense thicket. Clan members gather small plants and roots, eating as they move. Trevor watches them, suspicious. A small, red berry is handed to him.
38 81
EXT SMALL FIRE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SMALL FIRE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SMALL FIRE - MOMENTS LATER A quick stop. Trevor crouches by a small, efficient fire. He shakes the now peeled beans over the heat. SOPHIE What are you doing?
39 83
EXT SMALL FIRE NIGHT
EXT. SMALL FIRE - NIGHT
EXT. SMALL FIRE - NIGHT The group sits in a loose circle, the fire crackling between them. The Clan remains nearby—low silhouettes against the darkness. Trevor pokes at the embers with a stick. He is quiet.
40 86
EXT RIVER CROSSING DAY
EXT. RIVER CROSSING - DAY
EXT. RIVER CROSSING - DAY A fast-moving river cuts across their path. It isn’t wide, but it’s powerful. The water is a churning, relentless white. The group stops at the muddy bank. Trevor stares at the spray.
41 88
EXT RIDGE DAY
EXT. RIDGE - DAY
EXT. RIDGE - DAY The group crests a final rise. They stop. THE OCEAN Endless. Moving. Bright. Waves roll in from the horizon. The wind carries the sound. Silence falls over the group.
42 89
EXT SHORELINE DAY
EXT. SHORELINE - DAY
EXT. SHORELINE - DAY Trevor steps forward, cautious. The surf rolls in—loud, rhythmic. He watches it. Times it. Steps in— The water hits his shoes. Cold. He jerks back instantly.
43 91
EXT UNEVEN TERRAIN DAY
EXT. UNEVEN TERRAIN - DAY
EXT. UNEVEN TERRAIN - DAY The group moves with the massive hide. It is unstable. The water sloshes violently. Trevor adjusts his grip—wrong move. The hide tilts sharply. Water surges toward the low edge. SOPHIE
44 92
EXT RIVERBANK – DAY
EXT. RIVERBANK – DAY
EXT. RIVERBANK – DAY Movement in the reeds across the river. Everyone stills. A FIGURE stands partially hidden among the tall grass. Dark ash-painted skin. Spear. Watching. A RIVAL SCOUT.
45 94
EXT CLAN CAMP DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP - DAY
EXT. CLAN CAMP - DAY The group staggers into the center of the camp. They are a mess: exhausted, filthy, their modern synthetic clothes shredded by the trek. Between them, the massive mammoth hide sags, still miraculously holding most of the "Shit Water."
46 96
EXT CLAN CAMP MOMENTS LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. CLAN CAMP - MOMENTS LATER They emerge from the huts. They are now Stone Age versions of themselves—a surreal blend of the 21st century and the Pleistocene. Trevor looks down at his leather-fringe "slacks."
47 96
EXT CLAN CAMP NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP - NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP - NIGHT A smaller fire. The group sits closer now, their silhouettes blending with the Clan. The air is filled with familiar sounds—the crackle of wood, low rhythmic murmurs, the distant howl of the Pleistocene.
48 97
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY More built than ever before. Stone channels lead into sealed joints of mud and clay. The mammoth-hide reservoir sits at the center, connected to a crude but logical valve system. Trevor stares at the monstrosity.
49 100
EXT CLAN CAMP NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP - NIGHT
EXT. CLAN CAMP - NIGHT A larger fire than usual. The camp has settled into a comfortable, rhythmic hum. People move with routine. Sleeping spaces form naturally, a sea of furs and bodies. Trevor stands at the edge of the light for a moment.
50 101
EXT RIDGE OVERLOOKING CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
EXT. RIDGE OVERLOOKING CLAN CAMP – NIGHT
EXT. RIDGE OVERLOOKING CLAN CAMP – NIGHT Karr looks down on the clan camp. He sees the fire. The organization. Another clan HUNTER pats Karr's shoulder and points down. HUNTER
51 102
EXT CAMP CONTINUOUS
EXT. CAMP - CONTINUOUS
EXT. CAMP - CONTINUOUS The rival clan arrives in the camp. The Clan is surprised and creates a defensive barrier. The hunter steps forward. He points behind the Clan. The Clan parts. The hunter approaches the female he saw before.
52 103
EXT GEYSER FIELD DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY
EXT. GEYSER FIELD - DAY The final structure stands against the prehistoric sky. It is balanced, intentional, and reinforced with every lesson they’ve learned. Steam hisses through the mud-sealed joints with a steady, rhythmic pulse.
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INT MILES’ LAB DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB - DAY
INT. MILES’ LAB - DAY The portal snaps shut with an electric CRACK. Silence follows, thick and heavy. The four of them stand in the center of the high-tech lab, still draped in mud-stained mammoth hides and crude leather
54 110
EXT CITY STREET DAY
EXT. CITY STREET - DAY
EXT. CITY STREET - DAY The door to the building swings open. They emerge into the mid-day sun, all wearing "Miles." Miles looks exactly the same as the day he left. Sophie is swimming in an oversized blazer.
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EXT SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP DAY
EXT. SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP - DAY
EXT. SEATTLE COFFEE SHOP - DAY The street is busy. Normal. The four of them walk into the frame, still in their mismatched, ill-fitting "Miles-wear." They remain completely unbothered by the stares of the commuters.

Back to the Stone Age

After a cold‑fusion experiment hurls four Seattle misfits into the Stone Age, they must rebuild a portal from rocks, fire and ingenuity—while navigating wary clans—before a brief geyser‑pressure window closes.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Proposition

Premise‑delight set pieces where modern systems (logistics, branding, playlists, espresso) are repurposed as survival tech, with comedy from reciprocal culture transfer—prehistoric mimicry of our habits—and a clear, time‑boxed geyser engine driving ensemble growth.

AI Verdict


Synthesis Where readers agree and split
7.1

The script lands as a championable elevated-commercial comedy whose distinctive voice and set-piece execution outweigh structural looseness, pending a targeted rewrite to tighten causal pressure.

Readers read as Mainstream commercial1 Elevated commercial4 Comedy Sci fi

An elevated commercial ensemble comedy that bets on consistent tonal voice, character-specific absurdism, and light thematic warmth to deliver a broadly accessible but distinctively voiced fish-out-of-water premise.

Would readers champion it?
Not yetNot yetReaders wouldn’t actively push for it.
WeaklyWeaklyMentioned, but no real push behind it.
ModeratelyModeratelyMentioned favorably to the right buyer.
StronglyStronglyActively championed across their network.
DeepSeekWeaklyClaudeModeratelyGPT5ModeratelyGrokModeratelyGeminiStrongly
How much rewrite does it need?
Start from scratchStart from scratchPremise or core engine isn’t working. Page-one rebuild.
Structural rewriteStructural rewriteRe-architecting acts and arcs. Multi-month effort.
Targeted rewriteTargeted rewriteSpecific scenes or threads need rework. ~1 month.
Just polishJust polishLines and pacing tweaks. A few weeks.
ClaudeTargeted rewriteDeepSeekTargeted rewriteGPT5Targeted rewriteGeminiTargeted rewriteGrokTargeted rewrite
How distinctive is the voice?
GenericGenericReads like other scripts in the genre.
EmergingEmergingHints of a distinctive voice, not yet locked in.
DistinctiveDistinctiveA clear, recognizable authorial voice.
One-of-a-kindOne-of-a-kindA voice that couldn’t be anyone else’s.
DeepSeekEmergingGrokEmergingClaudeDistinctiveGPT5DistinctiveGeminiDistinctive

On the score: The score sits between two verdicts — small changes in either direction could flip it.

What's working 4 of 5 readers agree

The Tala-Trevor mimicry dynamic and premise-collision set pieces provide a championable emotional and comic anchor that distinguishes the script from generic ensemble comedies.

What's blocking All 5 readers agree

The episodic middle act lacks accumulating causal pressure, causing forward momentum to flatten and making the script feel longer than its page count.

Why not lower

The script’s tonal consistency, distinctive comedic register, and the Tala-Trevor relationship provide enough craft signal to hold it above a Pass.

Why not higher

Structural looseness in the middle act and underearned emotional payoffs prevent the script from reading as a fully realized draft rather than a strong first pass.

Fix-first · Protect-while-fixing · Reader splits · Quick credibility wins
Rewrite map

The ensemble converges on a targeted rewrite to convert the episodic middle act into a causal pressure chain while preserving the script’s distinctive tonal voice and ensemble chemistry.

Readers read as Mainstream commercial1 Elevated commercial4

Fix first 3
Middle-act episodic drift

The read loses forward momentum as sequences reset to baseline rather than compounding stakes or advancing the central objective.

Root cause

The geyser deadline arrives too late to organize preceding beats into a pressure chain, leaving the middle act structurally unmoored.

Passive character arc resolution Less critical

Character arcs resolve through passive accumulation rather than active turning points, leaving the final farewells feeling sweet but unanchored.

Root cause

Softening beats are distributed across multiple sequences without designating a causal moment of change or active choice.

Climactic resolution mechanics Medium confidence

The portal stabilization relies on an arbitrary sight-gag rather than accumulated character agency, weakening the payoff of the invention arc.

Root cause

The script treats the portal as a binary switch without dramatizing failure modes or establishing a clear, trackable success metric.

Protect while fixing 2
Tala-Trevor mimicry dynamic

Tightening the middle act or adding external jeopardy risks flattening the linguistic mimicry beats that anchor Trevor’s emotional shift and deliver the script’s strongest payoff.

Ensemble tonal consistency

Introducing compounding stakes or active antagonism to fix the episodic drift could push the register toward genuine survival thriller, breaking the deadpan/comic contract.

Reader splits 1
Antagonist pressure vs. internal friction Consequential
Side A

Introduce a persistent external threat (rival clan) to drive escalation and force harder choices.

Side B

Lean into sociological friction and internal desire conflict to preserve the hangout-comedy register and avoid tonal darkening.

Quick credibility wins 3
Redundant performance direction in action and dialogue
On-the-nose thematic dialogue
Typographic emphasis over prose rhythm
Story Facts
Genres:
Science Fiction 65% Comedy 60% Drama 40% Romance 20%

Setting: Prehistoric times and modern day, Seattle and a prehistoric landscape

Themes: Innovation vs. Existing Systems, Communication and Understanding, Adaptation and Integration, The Nature of Progress and Civilization, Human Connection and Belonging, The Accidental Catalyst and Unintended Consequences, The Search for Purpose and Meaning

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around the travelers' struggle to adapt to prehistoric life while trying to innovate energy solutions, with the stakes being their survival and the potential impact on both their world and the Clan's way of life.

Mood: Humorous and adventurous with moments of introspection.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of modern characters interacting with prehistoric clans while trying to innovate energy solutions.
  • Major Twist: The travelers inadvertently become cultural icons for the Clan, leading to humorous and unexpected situations.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of modern technology and concepts in a prehistoric setting, creating comedic contrasts.
  • Distinctive Settings: The juxtaposition of a high-tech Seattle lab and a chaotic prehistoric landscape.
  • Genre Blend: A mix of science fiction, comedy, and adventure that appeals to a wide audience.

Comparable Scripts: The Martian, Contact, The Big Bang Theory, Interstellar, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy, The Time Machine, Fringe, Arrival, The Good Place

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

Readers graded as Mainstream commercial1 Elevated commercial4
Claude GPT5 Gemini DeepSeek Grok Average spread Row tint: weak mid strong excellent
Premise i
7.8
Plot i
6.4
Structure i
6.6
Character i
7.0
Dialogue i
7.0
Tone / Voice i
7.8
Theme i
7.0
Marketability i
7.2
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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.75
Key Suggestions:
Focus on deepening secondary characters like Brug and Tala by adding specific motivations, emotional responses, and backstories in key scenes, while giving the rival clan clearer goals and perspectives to heighten conflict. Incorporate more reflective moments for vulnerability in Trevor and Miles, and tighten pacing by trimming drawn-out sequences or clarifying actions to sustain momentum and emotional impact.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Strengthen the script by deepening character arcs with explicit personal stakes and backstories to drive motivations, while tightening pacing through streamlined technical scenes and earlier integration of the rival clan for sustained conflict. Refine the beginning with a stronger visual hook and the ending with extended emotional farewells to better tie into themes of adaptation.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows strong foundational arcs for Trevor (skepticism to acceptance) and Miles (isolation to connection), but both rely too heavily on surface traits like humor and technical jargon. To elevate the script, integrate more scenes that force vulnerability—such as failed humor or simplified explanations—while using the prehistoric setting to mirror their internal growth, making emotional beats land harder than the comedic set pieces.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script, introduce more varied emotional beats like genuine awe or vulnerability to break the repetitive comedic rhythm, ensure smoother tonal transitions between high-energy chaos and reflective moments, and deepen individual character arcs—particularly for Trevor and Miles—by adding personal revelations that make their growth feel earned rather than rushed.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows a clear evolution in the protagonist's goals from pure scientific innovation toward valuing community and tradition, with strong resolution points late in the narrative. To strengthen the script, dramatize these internal shifts through specific, visual Clan interactions and collaborative problem-solving scenes rather than relying on Miles' observations or narration, ensuring the philosophical balance feels earned and emotionally resonant.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis underscores that the script succeeds when innovation is shown integrating with rather than overwriting existing systems, so deepen Zoe's bridging role and Miles' quiet realization in scene 26 to make the thematic payoff feel earned rather than abrupt; trim repetitive miscommunication beats to keep the focus on mutual adaptation.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten the script by reconciling Miles' core invention logic so the 'near-ambient' breakthrough doesn't contradict the later need for high-pressure geothermal and deuterium, while making Zoe's lab action feel motivated by her savvy rather than plot convenience. Trim repeated gags like the 'Okay' echoes and 'Good/Shit/Both' runner to keep them sharp, and replace the anachronistic coffee with a plausible native stimulant to avoid breaking immersion.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Build on the established voice by amplifying the use of irony, subtext, and repetition in dialogue to heighten tension and reveal character growth, while ensuring narrative descriptions maintain their focus on subtle actions and understated emotion to deepen immersion across both modern and prehistoric settings.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Focus on deepening character internal conflicts and motivations through targeted exercises like writing monologues, while refining dialogue for greater subtext and emotional nuance. Study structure and pacing techniques from resources like Save the Cat! and Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind to build tension more effectively and strengthen overall narrative flow.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The dual-world contrast between modern Seattle's tech-driven individualism and the Clan's communal, instinct-driven survival offers strong opportunities to sharpen character arcs, particularly by amplifying Miles' arc from fix-it innovator to someone who learns to respect existing systems rather than overhaul them.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows strong concept and plot consistency across all scenes, but emotional impact dips in reflective and resolution phases. Strengthen emotional layering in later contemplative scenes by integrating more character vulnerability and payoff moments, while preserving the effective use of humor in awkward transitions and tension in curious sequences to maintain momentum without structural changes.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (1)
  • Premise: 7.3 → 8.0 +0.7
Areas to Review (2)
  • Emotional Impact: 8.0 → 7.3 -0.7
  • Originality: 8.4 → 7.8 -0.6