Mind Hunter
Executive Summary
Pass/Consider/Recommend/Highly Recommend
Overview
Genres: Output:, Crime, Drama, Thriller
Setting: 1977, Pittsburgh
Overview: The screenplay demonstrates strong originality, creativity, and thematic depth in exploring the complexities of criminal psychology. While it effectively engages the audience with engaging dialogue and emotional depth, there is room for improvement in enhancing unpredictability and character changes. The script showcases a compelling conflict and presents opportunities for further development.
Themes: Communication and Connection, Mental Health and Emotional Struggles, Law Enforcement and Criminal Psychology, Relationships and Intimacy, Trauma and its Effects
Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts in this story include the Negotiator's struggle to establish communication with Cody and Holden's attempt to de-escalate the situation. The stakes are high as the Negotiator and Holden are trying to prevent a tragic outcome.
Overall Mood: Tense and suspenseful
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 2: Tense and suspenseful, with a tragic ending
Standout Features:
- Exploration of criminal psychology: The screenplay delves into the minds of criminals and the psychological aspects of their behavior.
- Tense and suspenseful scenes : The screenplay features scenes that will keep audiences on the edge of their seats.
- Complex and compelling characters : The screenplay presents characters with depth and complexity, making them relatable and engaging.
Comparable Scripts:
- Mindhunter (TV Show)
- Zodiac (Movie)
- True Detective (TV Show)
- Se7en (Movie)
- Silence of the Lambs (Movie)
- Heat (Movie)
- Training Day (Movie)
- Gone Girl (Movie)
- The Departed (Movie)
- The Wire (TV Show)
- American Crime Story: The People v. O.J. Simpson (TV Show)
- The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo (Book/Movie)
- Prisoners (Movie)
- The Killing (TV Show)
- The Silence of the Lambs (Book)
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$10-15 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of crime dramas and psychological thrillers
Marketability: The screenplay explores compelling themes and features tense and suspenseful scenes that will attract fans of crime dramas and psychological thrillers.
The screenplay has a unique blend of genres, including crime drama and psychological thriller, which will appeal to a wide audience.
The screenplay features strong and complex characters, which will attract audiences looking for character-driven stories.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, due to the strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for critical acclaim and awards.
Scene Level Percentiles
Emotions Elicited Percentiles
This is a rough estimate of how the average intensity of emotions elicited in this script compare to all scripts in the Vault (all genres).
Higher isn't necessarily better. This is FYI.
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice throughout the screenplay is concise, focused, and realistic. They use dialogue and narrative description to create tension, explore complex themes, and develop the characters. The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of seriousness and humor, as well as a strong emphasis on dialogue-driven scenes.
Best representation: Scene 3 - Negotiation Gone Awry. This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it showcases their ability to create vivid and evocative imagery, realistic dialogue, and explore complex internal conflicts.
Memorable Lines:
- CODY: You can see me, right? (Scene 1)
- Holden: How good is the book? (Scene 3)
- Wilson: These people... are people. (Scene 4)
- Holden: Complicated, right? Always expect 'complicated.' (Scene 12)
- McGraw: There’s nothing. There’s nothing people won’t do to each other. (Scene 18)
Writing Style:
The overall writing style of the screenplay is characterized by sharp and fast-paced dialogue, exploration of complex themes, and a focus on tension and suspense.
Style Similarities:
- Aaron Sorkin
- David Fincher
Story Shape
Emotions Elicited
Consider
Executive Summary
The screenplay for the TV pilot 'Mindhunter' shows promise, with several strong elements, including the collaborative dynamic between the two lead characters, Holden and Tench, and the exploration of Holden's emotional intelligence and willingness to challenge conventional thinking. However, the screenplay also has areas that could be improved, such as a stronger opening that better introduces the characters and their motivations, and a more cohesive exploration of the societal and historical context in which the story takes place. Additionally, the screenplay would benefit from a more developed approach to addressing the most extreme forms of violent crime, which is a central aspect of the show's premise. Overall, the screenplay is a solid starting point that could be further refined to create a compelling and engaging TV series.
- The scene where Tench and Holden present their theories to the local police department demonstrates their strong collaborative dynamic and ability to engage an audience. Tench's practical, experiential approach and Holden's more academic perspective complement each other well. high ( Scene 36 (INT. FAIRFIELD/LOCAL POLICE DEPARTMENT - DAY) )
- The scene where Holden and Debbie watch 'Dog Day Afternoon' shows Holden's empathy and emotional intelligence, as he is moved by the film's themes of identity and desperation. medium ( Scene 25 (INT. MOVIE CINEMA - NIGHT) )
- The class discussion on the Manson case highlights Holden's willingness to challenge conventional thinking and explore more nuanced perspectives on criminal psychology, even if it means clashing with more experienced officers. high ( Scene 39 (INT. FAIRFIELD POLICE DEPARTMENT - DAY) )
- The scene where Holden and Tench struggle to provide insight into the disturbing details of the Mary Jeffrey murder case reveals a gap in their knowledge and ability to address the most extreme forms of violent crime. This is an area that could be further developed. high ( Scene 42 (INT. INCIDENT ROOM/FAIRFIELD POLICE DEPARTMENT - NIGHT) )
- Holden's interaction with the lecturer, Leo, could be strengthened to better establish Holden's credibility and rapport with the academic community, which is an important aspect of his role. medium ( Scene 19 (INT. UNIVERSITY OF VIRGINIA/LECTURE THEATRE - DAY) )
- The screenplay would benefit from a stronger opening that better introduces the central characters, their motivations, and the overall premise of the show. The current opening, while dramatic, lacks sufficient context and character development. high ( Scene 1 (MINDHUNTER (EPISODE 1.)) )
- The screenplay could incorporate more information about the larger societal and historical context in which the story takes place, such as the evolving attitudes towards criminal psychology and the changing role of law enforcement in the 1970s. medium ( Scene 1 (MINDHUNTER (EPISODE 1.)) )
- The scene where Holden and Debbie discuss their relationship and intimacy highlights Holden's social awkwardness and lack of experience, which provides an interesting character depth and contrast to his professional expertise. medium ( Scene 28 (INT. DEBBIE'S BEDROOM - NIGHT) )
- The scene where Detective McGraw shares the disturbing details of the Mary Jeffrey case demonstrates the emotional toll that such extreme violence can have on law enforcement, and hints at the challenges Holden and Tench will face in navigating these types of crimes. high ( Scene 40 (INT. DINER - MAIN STREET - FAIRFIELD - EVENING) )
Screenplay Insights:
Premise: 7.9, This screenplay presents a promising premise for a captivating crime drama with a focus on criminal profiling and aberrant behavior. The narrative effectively sets up a scenario involving the FBI's efforts to delve into the minds of criminals, exploring the psychological complexities behind their actions. However, there are areas where the premise could be refined to further enhance its originality, clarity, and overall audience engagement. See More
Structure: 8.3, The tv_pilot establishes a strong foundation for a captivating psychological thriller. The narrative structure is well-crafted, effectively setting up the characters and central conflict, and capturing the audience's attention. However, there are certain areas where the plot could be further developed and refined to enhance its overall impact. See More
Theme: 9.2, The screenplay effectively explores and conveys themes of aberrant behavior, the challenges of understanding and classifying criminal behavior, and the tension between traditional law enforcement methods and innovative psychological approaches. The underlying messages about the complexity of human nature, the importance of empathy, and the need for a deeper understanding of the criminal mind are effectively woven into the narrative. However, some areas could benefit from further refinement to enhance the screenplay's thematic depth and resonance. See More
Visual Impact: 7.2, The screenplay’s visual imagery offers solid and detailed descriptions that effectively convey the scenes and characters, establishing a strong foundation for visual storytelling. However, the script could benefit greatly from employing more innovative and unique visual elements, exploring creative camera angles, and integrating symbolism to enhance its overall visual impact and originality. See More
Emotional Impact: 7.9, The screenplay demonstrates a clear emotional core and engages the audience with a complex and nuanced portrayal of its characters' emotions. However, there are opportunities to enhance the depth and complexity of the screenplay's emotional impact by further expanding on character exploration, refining emotional arcs, and exploring a broader range of emotions. See More
Conflict: 8.3, The screenplay effectively presents a compelling conflict and raises the stakes, establishing a tense and engaging narrative. However, there are opportunities to enhance the clarity of the conflict and further develop the stakes' personal significance. See More
Originality: 7.9, This screenplay demonstrates a strong commitment to originality and creativity in its exploration of the emerging field of criminal psychology and the uncharted territories of the human mind. It introduces a fresh perspective on crime investigation by incorporating psychological insights and unconventional approaches, setting it apart from traditional crime dramas. See More
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Summaries
- A negotiator attempts to communicate with Mr. Miller, while Cody asks if he can be seen.
- In this scene, a negotiator from the FBI, Holden Ford, arrives at an abandoned warehouse where a man named Cody Miller is holding a shotgun and demanding to see his wife. The police negotiator, Nankervis, is unsure how to handle the situation, but Holden takes charge and tries to establish a connection with Cody. As the tension rises, Cody unexpectedly strips naked, leaving everyone confused. Holden manages to convince Cody to come out and talk, but the scene ends with a shocking gunshot.
- Holden Ford, an FBI negotiator, arrives at an abandoned warehouse where Cody Miller is holding a shotgun and demanding to see his wife. Holden takes charge and tries to establish a connection with Cody. As tension rises, Cody unexpectedly strips naked, leaving everyone confused. Holden manages to convince Cody to come out and talk, but the scene ends with a shocking gunshot.
- Holden Ford, an FBI negotiator, arrives at an abandoned warehouse where Cody Miller is holding a shotgun and demanding to see his wife. Holden takes charge and tries to establish a connection with Cody. As tension rises, Cody unexpectedly strips naked, leaving everyone confused. Holden manages to convince Cody to come out and talk, but the scene ends with a shocking gunshot.
- Holden Ford, an FBI negotiator, arrives at an abandoned warehouse where Cody Miller is holding a shotgun and demanding to see his wife. Holden takes charge and tries to establish a connection with Cody. As tension rises, Cody unexpectedly strips naked, leaving everyone confused. Holden manages to convince Cody to come out and talk, but the scene ends with a shocking gunshot.
- Holden Ford, an FBI negotiator, meets a woman named Debbie at a bar. They engage in a conversation about their backgrounds and interests.
- Holden Ford meets Debbie at a bar and engages in a conversation about their backgrounds and interests. They discuss Durkheim's Labelling Theory on Deviancy and Holden's perspective as an FBI agent. The conversation becomes flirtatious and they decide to leave the bar together.
- Holden Ford meets Debbie at her share house. They engage in a flirtatious conversation while smoking marijuana. Holden becomes nervous and coughs after taking a hit from the bong.
- Holden Ford attends a training session at the FBI academy where he discusses the importance of psychology in criminal investigations with his superior, Shepard. They debate the relevance of academic research and the need for practical knowledge. Shepard offers Holden a deal to recommend him for funding if he helps with recruitment. The scene then transitions to Holden attending a lecture at the University of Virginia.
- Holden Ford engages in a dialogue with Leo, a criminal psychology professor, at the University of Virginia. They discuss the perception of criminals and the FBI's recruitment program. Holden tries to recruit Leo but faces resistance.
- Holden and Debbie have a flirtatious conversation after watching a movie. They discuss their thoughts on the film and Holden shares a personal experience from his time at the FBI academy. The conversation turns intimate as they explore their sexual desires and engage in role play. They also discuss their relationship and Holden's naivety. The scene ends with a moment of uncertainty and silence.
- Holden Ford teaches a class of FBI trainees about hostage negotiation techniques using a film example. He emphasizes the importance of empathy and understanding the psychology of criminals. The trainees engage in role play exercises to practice their negotiation skills.
- Holden Ford attends a training session at the FBI academy where he discusses the importance of psychology in criminal investigations with his superior, Shepard. They debate the relevance of academic research and the need for practical knowledge. Shepard offers Holden a deal to recommend him for funding if he helps with recruitment. The scene then transitions to Holden attending a lecture at the University of Virginia. Holden engages in a dialogue with Leo, a criminal psychology professor, at the University of Virginia. They discuss the perception of criminals and the FBI's recruitment program. Holden tries to recruit Leo but faces resistance. Holden and Debbie have a flirtatious conversation after watching a movie. They discuss their thoughts on the film and Holden shares a personal experience from his time at the FBI academy. The conversation turns intimate as they explore their sexual desires and engage in role play. They also discuss their relationship and Holden's naivety. The scene ends with a moment of uncertainty and silence. Holden Ford teaches a class of FBI trainees about hostage negotiation techniques using a film example. He emphasizes the importance of empathy and understanding the psychology of criminals. The trainees engage in role play exercises to practice their negotiation skills.
- Holden Ford meets Bill Tench, a Behavioral Science agent, at the FBI training academy cafeteria. They discuss Holden's role in recruitment and Tench's idea of teaching classes in various police departments. Tench offers Holden a chance to help each other. The scene then transitions to Tench and Holden driving to Iowa for their teaching session.
- Holden and Tench arrive at the Fairfield Police Department in Iowa to teach a class of local police officers and detectives. The officers are skeptical and unsure about the new approach of using psychology in criminal investigations. Holden and Tench emphasize the importance of understanding the psychology of criminals and analyzing their behavior to solve crimes. They discuss the challenges of finding motive and the unfathomable nature of humanity. The scene ends with the officers looking skeptical and Holden's attempt to connect with them falling flat.
- Holden and Tench teach a class of local police officers and detectives at the Fairfield Police Department in Iowa. The officers are skeptical about using psychology in criminal investigations. Holden and Tench emphasize the importance of understanding the psychology of criminals and analyzing their behavior to solve crimes. The scene ends with the officers looking skeptical and Holden's attempt to connect with them falling flat.
- Holden and Tench teach a class of local police officers and detectives at the Fairfield Police Department in Iowa. The officers are skeptical about using psychology in criminal investigations. Holden and Tench emphasize the importance of understanding the psychology of criminals and analyzing their behavior to solve crimes. The scene ends with the officers looking skeptical and Holden's attempt to connect with them falling flat.
- Holden and Tench teach a class of local police officers and detectives at the Fairfield Police Department in Iowa. The officers are skeptical about using psychology in criminal investigations. Holden and Tench emphasize the importance of understanding the psychology of criminals and analyzing their behavior to solve crimes. The scene ends with the officers looking skeptical and Holden's attempt to connect with them falling flat.
- Holden and Tench discuss the details of a murder case with McGraw, who is desperate for answers. Holden admits his lack of understanding and apologizes for wasting their time. The scene ends with Holden and Tench feeling unsettled.
- Holden and Tench discuss their lack of understanding in solving a murder case, feeling unsettled and unsure of their abilities. They question the effectiveness of using psychology in criminal investigations and express skepticism about their own authority in providing answers to desperate individuals like McGraw.
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Character Holden Ford
Description Holden oscillates between advocating for understanding criminal psychology and dismissing the relevance of academic perspectives. This inconsistency raises questions about his core motivations and beliefs.
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Character Debbie
Description Debbie's initial skepticism and dismissive attitude towards Holden seem to shift rather abruptly into a more intimate and understanding relationship. The transition could be smoother.
( Scene 6 (13) Scene 7 (14) )
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Description The Fairfield case is presented as a motiveless crime, but later discussions hint at sexual motivation and a potential connection to the church. This inconsistency in the nature of the crime needs clarification.
( Scene 17 (39) Scene 19 (42) )
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Description Holden's use of 'Dog Day Afternoon' as a training tool seems incongruous with his earlier critique of outdated hostage negotiation methods. The film depicts a situation that escalated due to poor communication and tactical errors.
( Scene 12 (29) )
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Description Holden's academic language and references to Dostoevsky and Freud feel out of place when addressing local police officers. The dialogue could be adapted to better suit the audience and context.
( Scene 16 (37) )
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Element Holden's self-doubt and questioning of his knowledge
( Scene 3 (7) Scene 14 (33) Scene 19 (42) Scene 20 (44) )
Suggestion While Holden's internal conflict is important, the repeated expressions of self-doubt could be streamlined to maintain narrative momentum and avoid redundancy.
Holden - Score: 72/100
Character Analysis Overview
Cody - Score: 70/100
Role
Antagonist
Character Analysis Overview
Debbie - Score: 67/100
Character Analysis Overview
Bill - Score: 76/100
Role
Mentor
Character Analysis Overview
Tench - Score: 73/100
Role
Mentor
Character Analysis Overview
Shepard - Score: 63/100
Character Analysis Overview
Theme | Theme Details | Theme Explanation |
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Communication and Connection | The Negotiator trying to establish communication with Cody, Holden's attempt to de-escalate the situation with Cody, Holden's interaction with the police negotiator and other officers, Holden's conversation with Cody's wife Sissy about their troubled relationship, Holden and Wilson discussing their work as agents, Holden and Debbie discussing their backgrounds and interests, Holden and Debbie discussing their relationship, Holden and Debbie discussing their lack of knowledge about certain topics, Holden and Tench discussing their theories with young police officers, Holden presenting information to the class about Charles Manson, Holden and Tench analyzing crime scene photos with Detective McGraw | Communication and connection is a recurring theme in this screenplay. It explores the challenges and importance of effective communication in various situations, such as hostage negotiation, relationship dynamics, and sharing knowledge and theories in law enforcement. The characters' attempts to establish connections and understand each other drive the plot and shape their interactions. |
Mental Health and Emotional Struggles | Cody's unstable state and possession of a shotgun, Cody's tragic ending, Holden reflecting on a recent incident involving a bloodied dying man, Holden questioning whether he could have done more to help the man, Holden frustrated and questioning the effectiveness of the FBI's procedures, Holden's despondency and frustration with teaching, Holden and Tench discussing their frustrations, Detective McGraw's emotional response to the murder case, Holden's frustration with the lack of understanding of aberrant behavior | Mental health and emotional struggles are explored throughout the screenplay. Characters like Cody, Holden, and Detective McGraw grapple with their own emotional states and the impact of traumatic events. The theme highlights the toll that these struggles can take on individuals and their ability to cope with challenging situations. |
Law Enforcement and Criminal Psychology | Holden teaching a class on hostage negotiation, Holden observing Wilson's class on investigating motiveless crimes, Holden discussing the importance of identifying a perpetrator before negotiating, Holden and Wilson discussing criminal behavior, Holden and Tench teaching classes to local law enforcement, Holden and Tench analyzing crime scene photos, Holden and Tench discussing their theories with young police officers | Law enforcement and criminal psychology are central themes in this screenplay. The characters' work in the FBI and their interactions with law enforcement officers and trainees provide insights into the challenges and strategies involved in investigating crimes and understanding criminal behavior. The theme explores the complexities of law enforcement and the psychological aspects of criminal investigations. |
Relationships and Intimacy | Holden and Debbie discussing their backgrounds and interests, Holden and Debbie discussing their relationship, Holden and Debbie discussing their lack of knowledge about certain topics, Holden and Debbie having sex and discussing their relationship afterwards, Holden and Tench discussing their frustrations, Holden and Tench offering advice and support to each other, Holden and Debbie's flirtatious conversations, Holden and Tench's friendly and collegial interactions | Relationships and intimacy play a significant role in this screenplay. The romantic relationship between Holden and Debbie, as well as the friendship and mentorship between Holden and Tench, provide emotional depth and personal connections for the characters. The theme explores the complexities and dynamics of relationships, both romantic and platonic. |
Trauma and its Effects | Cody's tragic ending, Holden reflecting on a recent incident involving a bloodied dying man, Holden questioning whether he could have done more to help the man, Holden frustrated and questioning the effectiveness of the FBI's procedures, Holden's despondency and frustration with teaching, Detective McGraw's emotional response to the murder case, Holden's frustration with the lack of understanding of aberrant behavior | Trauma and its effects are recurring themes in this screenplay. Characters like Cody, Holden, and Detective McGraw experience and grapple with the aftermath of traumatic events. The theme explores the psychological and emotional impact of trauma on individuals and their ability to navigate their personal and professional lives. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolve throughout the script, reflecting their need for recognition, validation, closure, connection, and companionship. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals evolve throughout the script, reflecting their immediate circumstances and challenges in their career and personal life. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the protagonist's beliefs and values about criminal behavior, the nature of criminals, and the importance of understanding motives. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's evolving internal and external goals contribute to their development by challenging their beliefs, values, and worldview. They are forced to confront their limitations, question established methods, and seek validation and acceptance from others.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The evolving goals and conflicts provide a narrative structure that drives the protagonist's journey and creates tension and suspense. They also serve as catalysts for character growth and development.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring the complexities of criminal behavior, the importance of empathy and understanding, and the limitations of traditional approaches to law enforcement. They also delve into the nature vs. nurture debate and challenge societal perceptions of criminals.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Negotiation | tense, serious | 7 | 6 | 5 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 4 | 5 | 5 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
2 - Negotiation at the Warehouse | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 7 | 8 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
3 - Negotiation Gone Awry | Tense, Confused, Shocking | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
4 - Negotiation Gone Awry | Tense, Confused, Shocking | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
5 - Negotiation Gone Awry | Tense, Confusing, Shocking | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 4 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
6 - Holden's Encounter at the Bar | Tense, Confused, Shocking | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 5 | 3 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
7 - Bar Conversation | Tense, Intellectual, Flirtatious | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 3 | 8 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 3 | 5 | 7 | 5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
8 - Intimate Conversation | Tense, Flirtatious, Mysterious | 7 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 8 | 3 | 8 | 6 | 3 | 6 | 2 | 4 | 5 | 4 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
9 - FBI Training and Academic Discussion | Tense, Serious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
10 - Recruitment and Dialogue | Intense, Serious, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
11 - Flirtatious Conversation and Intimacy | Flirtatious, Casual, Playful | 8 | 7 | 6 | 4 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 4 | 2 | 3 | 5 | 3 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | |
12 - Hostage Negotiation Training | Intense, Educational, Engaging | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
13 - Training and Recruitment | Intense, Serious, Tense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
14 - Recruitment and Connection | Serious, Intimate, Tense | 8 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
15 - FBI Training Session in Fairfield | Intense, Serious, Informative | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 3 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 4 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
16 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department | Serious, Humorous | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
17 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department | Serious, Intense, Controversial | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
18 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department | Tense, Dark, Emotive | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
19 - The Dark Abyss | Suspenseful, Intense, Serious | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
20 - Doubt and Desperation | Serious, Intense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are some things that came out of the scene level analysis.
This is a summary of the strengths, weaknesses, and suggestions found in each scene. Some things might appear in both strengths and weaknesses based on the variety of your scenes.
For summary of each criteria click in the top row on the criteria.
Scene Strengths
- Engaging dialogue
- Tension building
- Unexpected twists
- Exploration of psychology in criminal investigations
- Strong ending
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development
- Minimal emotional impact
- Lack of significant conflict
- Limited exploration of the psychology concept
- Lack of impactful dialogue
Suggestions
- Focus on developing characters' motivations and emotional depth
- Further explore and develop plot and theme
- Work on creating more impactful and engaging dialogue
- Increase external conflict and stakes to create tension
- Expand exploration of psychology concept
Scene 1 - Negotiation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 2 - Negotiation at the Warehouse
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 3 - Negotiation Gone Awry
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 4 - Negotiation Gone Awry
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 5 - Negotiation Gone Awry
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 6 - Holden's Encounter at the Bar
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 7 - Bar Conversation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 8 - Intimate Conversation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 9 - FBI Training and Academic Discussion
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 10 - Recruitment and Dialogue
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 11 - Flirtatious Conversation and Intimacy
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 12 - Hostage Negotiation Training
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 13 - Training and Recruitment
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 14 - Recruitment and Connection
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 15 - FBI Training Session in Fairfield
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 16 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 17 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 18 - Teaching at Fairfield Police Department
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 19 - The Dark Abyss
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Scene 20 - Doubt and Desperation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
Consider
Explanation: The screenplay for the TV pilot 'Mindhunter' shows promise, with several strong elements, including the collaborative dynamic between the two lead characters, Holden and Tench, and the exploration of Holden's emotional intelligence and willingness to challenge conventional thinking. However, the screenplay also has areas that could be improved, such as a stronger opening that better introduces the characters and their motivations, and a more cohesive exploration of the societal and historical context in which the story takes place. Additionally, the screenplay would benefit from a more developed approach to addressing the most extreme forms of violent crime, which is a central aspect of the show's premise. Overall, the screenplay is a solid starting point that could be further refined to create a compelling and engaging TV series.