Eternal Sunshin of the Spotless Mind

After a volatile breakup, a heartbroken man discovers his ex has paid to erase him from her mind — he follows the clinic into his own memories to stop the procedure and, in the process, relives the best and worst of love.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its revolutionary approach to the romance genre by blending high-concept science fiction with intimate psychological drama. Unlike traditional love stories, it explores relationships through the lens of memory manipulation, creating a profound meditation on how love persists even when memories are erased. The non-linear structure that moves backward through a relationship's dissolution while the protagonist fights to preserve it creates an emotionally resonant and intellectually stimulating experience that challenges conventional storytelling.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Highly Recommend
Grok
 Highly Recommend
Gemini
 Highly Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Highly Recommend
Average Score: 9.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The screenplay's core — the memory-erasure conceit married to Joel and Clementine's messy, lived-in romance — is distinctive and emotionally rich. To elevate it further, tighten and deepen the Lacuna subplot so the ethical stakes land as powerfully as the personal ones. Specifically, strengthen Mary’s motivation and show the immediate and downstream consequences of her decision to distribute files (one or two targeted scenes: an intimate flashback that makes her whistleblowing inevitable, and a compact aftermath beat that shows personal cost and institutional fallout). Also give Naomi and a couple of key secondary players one clarifying beat so their choices feel earned. These are surgical, creative fixes that preserve the script’s poetry while removing the thinness that critics will flag as a plot gap.
For Executives:
This is a high-value, festival- and awards-friendly screenplay: original premise, strong lead roles, and distinctive visual opportunities that make it attractive to an auteur director and star talent. The principal risk is not marketability but perceived narrative sloppiness around Lacuna’s consequences and Mary/secondary arcs — critics and discerning audiences may read those as plot holes. Fortunately the fixes are low-to-mid budget (add 1–3 scenes that solidify motive and fallout) and will materially reduce risk without altering the film’s tone. Position and market it as a smart, adult romance with a speculative hook; emphasize the emotional stakes in marketing and the director’s visual signature in festival positioning.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Romance 50% Science Fiction 30% Fantasy 25%

Setting: Contemporary, with elements of the near future, New York City, including various modern and surreal settings such as a publishing house, doctor's office, commuter tubes, and intimate apartments.

Themes: Memory and Erasure, Love and Connection, Identity and Selfhood, Emotional Pain and Mental Health, The Cyclical Nature of Relationships and Life, Truth and Illusion, The Search for Meaning and Happiness

Conflict & Stakes: The central conflict revolves around Joel's emotional struggle with his relationship with Clementine and the ethical implications of memory erasure, with the stakes being the loss of meaningful connections and the consequences of forgetting one's past.

Mood: Melancholic and introspective, with moments of humor and surrealism.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of memory erasure as a therapeutic procedure raises ethical questions and personal dilemmas.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that Clementine has also undergone memory erasure, complicating their relationship further.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of surreal visuals to represent memory decay and emotional states enhances the storytelling.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between the cold, clinical environments of the memory clinic and the warmth of personal memories.
  • Character Depth: Complex characters with relatable struggles that resonate with audiences.

Comparable Scripts: Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, Being John Malkovich, Her, The Science of Sleep, Synecdoche, New York, Anomalisa, The Notebook, Lost in Translation, The Fountain

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Character Development (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Character Development (Script Level) score: 7.4
Typical rewrite gain: +0.45 in Character Development (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~4,107 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Character Development (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Character Development (Script Level) by about +0.45 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.8
Typical rewrite gain: +0.7 in Conflict (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~687 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.7 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Dialogue
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Dialogue score: 8.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Dialogue
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,902 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Dialogue by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.30
Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's core emotional engine — Joel and Clementine's relationship — is powerful and original, but its impact is being undercut by supporting characters whose motives and stakes feel underdeveloped (Stan, Patrick, Mary, Mierzwiak). Strengthen those secondary arcs so they actively shape the central conflict: give each supporting character a clear want, a past that explains their choices, and at least one scene that shows the consequences of Lacuna's work on them. Also tighten transitions through small, consistent cinematic cues (sound motifs, color shifts, prop beats) so the non‑linear memory sequences read emotionally rather than just stylistically. These targeted rewrites will deepen theme, clarify stakes, and make the emotional payoff far more resonant.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful central idea and two compelling leads, but the formal experimentation (nonlinear memory erasure) sometimes undercuts emotional clarity. The most effective fixes are craft-based: deepen a few key backstory moments so Joel and Clementine's choices feel earned, and tighten/clarify the transitions between memory and present so the audience can follow the emotional through-line. Use recurring sensory anchors (sound motifs, objects, or visual cues) and prune repetitive scenes that don't advance character or stakes. Small structural edits will preserve the film's inventive voice while making its emotional payoff more immediate and humane.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong around Joel and Clementine—their emotional beats land and provide the script's core. The areas that need tightening are the Lacuna subplot and its personnel: Howard (Mierzwiak) currently reads as morally ambiguous but inert, and Mary/Stan function as important thematic vectors without decisive arcs. To strengthen the script, heighten Howard’s moral stakes (force a concrete, costly choice) and make Mary the active conscience whose choices produce clear consequences. Trim or rework scenes that only exposit; instead show decisions and fallout on-screen so the theme (memory, responsibility, the ethics of erasure) is emotionally and dramatically felt, not merely explained in voice‑over or documents.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
Your script delivers a powerful emotional core — especially in the Joel/Clementine beats and the memory-erasure set pieces — but risks overwhelming viewers by sustaining very high-intensity sadness across long stretches (roughly scenes 9–35). To strengthen impact, create clearer emotional contrast: expand and deepen lighter, joyful or humorous moments (extend diner/train/first-meeting scenes, make happy memories more vivid), vary the kinds of sadness (nostalgia, regret, loneliness) so it feels textured rather than monotonous, and give Lacuna staff small personal stakes to humanize procedural scenes. These changes will preserve the screenplay’s emotional truth while improving pacing and audience endurance.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The goals analysis shows the screenplay’s emotional engine is Joel’s internal journey from avoidance to acceptance — and the central philosophical question is Memory vs. Identity. To strengthen the script, sharpen Joel’s throughline: make his changing internal stakes and the moment of choice clearer and better signposted so the audience can feel each step of his transformation. Tighten or clarify memory-sequence transitions (and supporting beats with Mary/Howard/Stan) so that the thematic payoff—choosing to live with painful memories rather than erase them—lands with emotional clarity rather than conceptual confusion.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core — that you cannot truly erase pain without losing parts of yourself — is powerful and clear. Strengthen it by tightening the throughline: make the choice to erase (and its consequences) feel earned for each character, and dramatize the alternative (acceptance/integration) with concrete beats. Simplify or clarify the nonlinear memory-hopping so the audience can follow emotional causality (not just a collage of vignette-memories). Give sensory anchors and recurring motifs to help memory-scenes land emotionally, and tighten secondary arcs (Mary, Stan, Mierzwiak) so they reflect and complicate Joel and Clementine's primary moral choices rather than distract from them.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core emotional engine — a couple trying to hold onto love while memories are surgically erased — is powerful, but the audience is repeatedly pulled out of the story by unclear mechanics and uneven characterization. Your priority should be to codify the rules of the Lacuna procedure (what can/can't be erased, how traces remain, how/why clients can re-encounter each other) and then rework scenes so every character beat follows from that logic. Once the procedure's rules are fixed, prune redundant emotional set-pieces (particularly multiple similar Clementine outbursts) and tighten dialogue so shifts in tone or vulnerability feel earned rather than abrupt.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
You have a strong, distinctive voice—melancholic, introspective, and quietly surreal—that gives the material emotional weight. To strengthen the script craft-wise, preserve that tonal signature but tighten the structure: streamline repetitive memory-erasure beats, sharpen scene-to-scene causal clarity, and increase active, character-driven beats that push the story forward. Make sure each fading memory or poetic image advances an emotional choice or stakes for Joel (or reveals new information about Clementine) so the mood never becomes self-indulgent at the expense of narrative momentum.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You already have a powerful emotional core and memorable set pieces. The highest-leverage rewrite is to sharpen how that emotion is delivered: tighten dialogue so it carries more subtext, deepen characters' interior logic so their choices feel earned, and streamline scene pacing so the non-linear memory work reads as purposeful rather than diffuse. Practical steps: cut overt exposition, let small physical details and contradictions reveal who the characters are, and workshop key scenes aloud to find the unsaid beats that will make the audience feel rather than be told.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is a strong blend of intimate romance and speculative tech, but it risks alienating the audience if the emotional logic is swallowed by surreal set-pieces. Focus on anchoring the big, dreamlike memory sequences with clear sensory rules and tighter cause-and-effect: make the memory-erasure technology's mechanics (what can/cannot be erased, how memories decay, sensory markers) consistent and emotionally consequential. Trim or clarify scenes that drift into ‘vague’ or repetitive decay so every surreal beat advances character stakes — especially Joel’s agency — and preserves the bittersweet tone without confusing the viewer.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your screenplay’s core strength is emotional depth and character change, often amplified by surreal textures. However, quiet, reflective scenes frequently coincide with lowered external stakes, producing uneven pacing. To tighten the script, consciously balance introspective sequences with small-but-clear external consequences or micro-conflicts (or use dialogue to create tension), and lean into the surreal as a deliberate stylistic signature rather than an accidental effect. That will preserve the film’s emotional intimacy while maintaining forward momentum and audience investment.
Loglines
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