Squid Game

Executive Summary

Overview

Genres: The, unique, genres, for, this, movie, would, be:, Thriller, Drama, and, Action

Setting: Contemporary, Game arena, VIP Room 2, playground, Gi-hun's home, bank, riverside, private hospital room, room with a window overlooking a snowy street, private hospital room, ICN airport subway platform and lobby

Overview: Squid Game is a thrilling and intense story that follows Gi-hun, a struggling man who is desperate for money. He is invited to participate in a deadly game where the stakes are high and the consequences are deadly. As the games progress, Gi-hun forms unexpected alliances, confronts his own moral dilemmas, and ultimately seeks redemption. The story explores themes of betrayal, survival, friendship, guilt, and power, while keeping the audience on the edge of their seats with its suspenseful and unpredictable twists.

Themes: Betrayal and Deception, Survival and Desperation, Friendship and Loyalty, Guilt and Redemption, Power and Control

Conflict and Stakes: The primary conflicts in this story include the life-or-death struggle of the characters in the deadly games, the rivalry and betrayal between Gi-hun and Sang-woo, and Gi-hun's personal journey of redemption. The stakes are high as the characters' lives are on the line, and their actions have consequences for themselves and others.

Overall Mood: Tense and suspenseful

Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:

  • Scene 1: The scene has a tense and suspenseful mood as Sang-woo and Gi-hun are chosen to play the final game and face off against each other.
  • Scene 2: The scene has an intense and violent mood as Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a bloody knife fight.
  • Scene 3: The scene has a tragic and heartbreaking mood as Sang-woo stabs himself and Gi-hun holds him as he dies.
  • Scene 4: The scene has a somber and reflective mood as Gi-hun mourns his mother's death and learns about the VIP service.
  • Scene 5: The scene has a tense and philosophical mood as Il-nam proposes a bet to Gi-hun and they discuss the value of human life.
  • Scene 6: The scene has a bittersweet mood as Il-nam dies and Gi-hun reflects on their time together before starting a new chapter in his life.
  • Scene 7: The scene has a tense and urgent mood as Gi-hun confronts the Man in a Jumper at the airport.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Concept: The Squid Game concept, where participants compete in deadly children's games, is a standout feature that sets it apart from other thrillers.
  • Twists and Betrayals: The screenplay's numerous plot twists and betrayals keep the audience engaged and guessing.
  • Social Commentary: The screenplay's exploration of social issues and commentary on the corrupting influence of money and power adds depth and relevance to the story.
  • Intense and Suspenseful: The screenplay's intense and suspenseful moments create a gripping viewing experience.
  • Diverse Cast: The screenplay features a diverse cast, which adds to its appeal and reflects the multicultural nature of the story.
  • Genre Blend: The screenplay successfully blends elements of thriller, drama, and social commentary, creating a unique and compelling narrative.
  • Strong Performances: The screenplay features strong performances by the cast, which enhance the emotional impact of the story.
  • Visual Elements: The screenplay incorporates visually striking elements, such as the rain falling on Gi-hun during the Squid Game and the snowy street outside the window.
  • Emotional Depth: The screenplay delves into the emotional depth of the characters, exploring themes of friendship, betrayal, and redemption.
  • Thought-Provoking Themes: The screenplay raises thought-provoking themes about the value of life, the human condition, and the corrupting influence of money and power.
  • International Appeal: The Squid Game's international popularity and success on streaming platforms indicate its potential for global appeal.
  • Critical Acclaim: The screenplay's strong storytelling, compelling characters, and social commentary make it a potential contender for critical acclaim and award nominations.

Comparable Scripts:

  • Battle Royale
  • The Hunger Games
  • Oldboy
  • The Saw franchise
  • The Running Man
  • The Most Dangerous Game
  • The Maze Runner
  • No Escape
  • The Belko Experiment
  • Cube

Writing Style:

The writing style of the screenplay is characterized by a focus on complex themes, exploration of moral dilemmas, and building tension through suspense and escalating conflicts. The writers also incorporate dark humor and explore societal issues in their stories.

Style Similarities:

  • Christopher Nolan
  • Bong Joon-ho
Other Similarities
Pass/Consider/Recommend

Recommend


Explanation: The screenplay for the TV episode of Squid Game is highly recommended. It effectively establishes the final game, Squid Game, and the rules that the characters must follow, creating a sense of anticipation and tension. The character arcs for Gi-hun and Sang-woo are well-developed and emotionally impactful, exploring themes of morality, guilt, and redemption. The dialogue and performances of the actors add depth and intensity to the scenes. However, there are areas for improvement, such as the need for more impactful and memorable dialogue, smoother transitions between scenes, and clearer explanations of certain elements. Overall, the screenplay offers a compelling and engaging narrative with thought-provoking themes and notable scenes that leave a lasting impact on the audience.


USP: The Unique Selling Proposition in this screenplay lies in its intense and emotionally charged scenes that delve into the complexities of human nature, morality, and the consequences of participating in deadly games. With innovative storytelling techniques, such as unexpected plot twists and character revelations, this script sets itself apart from others in its genre. It offers a compelling and thought-provoking narrative that will captivate its target audience, leaving them on the edge of their seats and questioning the choices and actions of the characters.
Market Analysis

Budget Estimate:$30-40 million

Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-54, fans of suspenseful and thought-provoking dramas with elements of thriller and social commentary.

Marketability: The Squid Game has gained significant international popularity and has a strong potential to attract a wide audience due to its unique concept, intense storytelling, and compelling characters. It has already proven to be highly marketable through its success on streaming platforms.

The screenplay offers a unique blend of genres, combining elements of thriller, drama, and social commentary. It explores compelling themes and features a diverse cast, which adds to its marketability.

The screenplay's gripping storyline, relevant social themes, and strong performances by the cast make it appealing to a wide audience. However, its violent and intense nature may limit its marketability to some viewers.

Profit Potential: High, due to the strong appeal of the Squid Game concept, its international popularity, and potential for award nominations. The screenplay's thought-provoking themes and intense storytelling can generate significant buzz and attract a large audience, resulting in high box office and streaming revenue.

Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice

Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by concise and impactful dialogue, minimalistic description, and a focus on tension, suspense, and moral dilemmas. The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of urgency, exploring deeper themes, and developing complex characters through dialogue and action.

Best representation: Scene 6 - The Revelation and Departure. This scene is the best representation because it showcases their ability to create tension and mystery through concise dialogue and descriptive narrative.

Memorable Lines:

  • Gi-hun: You killed them. You’re the one who killed them! (Scene 2)
  • Sang-woo: Gi-hun. I’m sorry. (Scene 3)
  • Il-nam: You asked me why I let you live. Because it was fun playing with you. (Scene 6)
  • Il-nam: If you play the game, I'll answer your questions. (Scene 5)
  • Gi-hun: That's why I can't forgive you for everything you're doing. (Scene 7)
Characters

Gi-hun:Protagonist who participates in the deadly games and experiences personal growth and redemption

Sang-woo:Gi-hun's childhood friend who becomes a rival and ultimately meets a tragic end

Il-nam:The elderly man who created the Squid Game and forms a bond with Gi-hun

Masked Soldier:The enigmatic figure who oversees the games and provides instructions

Masked Soldier 2:Another masked soldier who confirms the termination of the game

Manager:Bank manager who informs Gi-hun of a new VIP service

Old Lady:A mysterious old lady who gives Gi-hun a message card

Passerby:A person who tries to help a homeless man

Policeman:A police officer who responds to a disturbance

Front Man:The leader of the masked soldiers

Hairdresser:A hair salon employee who gives Gi-hun a new haircut

Cheol:A former player who now lives in an orphanage dorm

Sang-woo's Mom:Sang-woo's mother who runs a fish bun cart

Suited Man:A man playing ddakji at the airport

Man in a Jumper:A man who confronts Gi-hun at the airport

Story Shape
Summary In "Squid Game," Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death during the final game. Sang-woo reveals that he killed someone to secure his own survival, leading to a heated argument between the two. Gi-hun ultimately decides to end the game and approach the Masked Soldier to invoke the clause for termination. The unexpected turn of events leaves everyone puzzled. Gi-hun returns home to find his mother dead, leading him to a downward spiral of homelessness and despair, but a year later, he encounters a mysterious message that leads him to a private hospital room where he discovers Il-nam, the old man from the Squid Game. The scene explores themes of loss, redemption, and the consequences of participating in the deadly games.


Screenplay Story Analysis

Story Critique The plot/story of the screenplay is engaging and suspenseful, with well-developed characters and emotional depth. The use of flashbacks adds depth to the relationships between the characters and enhances the overall narrative. The conflicts and resolutions throughout the story keep the audience invested and interested. The emotional tone of each scene is effectively conveyed, creating a strong connection between the characters and the audience. The significant visual elements add visual interest and enhance the storytelling. However, there are some areas where the plot/story could be improved.
Suggestions: 1. Provide more clarity and explanation about the purpose and rules of the Squid Game. This will help the audience understand the stakes and motivations of the characters. 2. Develop the conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun further, exploring their contrasting ideologies and motivations. This will add depth to their relationship and make their final confrontation more impactful. 3. Consider adding more scenes that explore the psychological toll of the game on the characters, showcasing their internal struggles and growth. This will add depth to their character arcs and make their actions more meaningful. 4. Provide a stronger resolution to the conflict between Gi-hun and the people behind the game. This will give the story a more satisfying conclusion and tie up loose ends. Overall, the plot/story of the screenplay is strong, but these suggestions can help elevate it to the next level.

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1 - The Final Game Begins Intense, Suspenseful, Violent 8 8 77 8 787989887 79999
2 - The Final Showdown Intense, Confrontational, Emotional 9 8 99 9 88910910999 810998
3 - The Tragic End Intense, Emotional, Tragic 9 8 99 9 9108981091010 810998
4 - Gi-hun's Tragic Reunion Intense, Emotional, Grim 9 8 86 9 9879898710 79898
5 - The Final Game Intense, Despairing, Mysterious 9 8 99 9 88710810989 89998
6 - The Final Showdown Intense, Emotional, Mysterious 9 8 97 9 88710710989 89998
7 - The Revelation and Departure Intense, Emotional, Puzzling 9 8 96 9 987108109810 89998


Scene 1 - The Final Game Begins
SQUID GAME


EPISODE 109
“ONE LUCKY DAY”




Written by
Hwang Dong-hyuk
1. INT. WAITING AREA

Sang-woo and Gi-hun stand glaring at each other outside the game arena entrance.

MASKED SOLDIER
Player 218 and 456. Welcome to the final game.
Before we begin, we will toss a coin to determine
offense and defense. Please, choose between triangle
or square.

GI-HUN
Triangle.

SANG-WOO
...

The coin is tossed into the air, and it comes back down, lands in the Masked Soldier's palm. He
immediately closes his fist, slaps the coin onto the back of his opposite hand, then -- reveals the
coin to show -- triangle.

MASKED SOLDIER
It's a triangle.
(to Gi-hun)
Please choose between offense and defense.

GI-HUN
Offense.

MASKED SOLDIER
No. 456 is offense, and No. 218 is defense!

MASKED SOLDIER
The last game is the Squid Game.


2. INT. VIP ROOM 2

This room is on the 2nd floor at the end of the corridor leading to the arena. The VIPs stand
before the plate glass window that looks out on the arena and -- the 2 men entering it.
The Squid Game field drawn on the arena stretches out before them.

VIP 1 (ENGLISH)
Squid Game... what an odd name.

FRONT MAN (ENGLISH)
It was originally a children's game
that was played in Korea many years ago.


3. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD – GAME ARENA - DAY

Masked Soldier walks Gi-hun and Sang-woo to the Squid Game field.

MASKED SOLDIER
I will explain the rules. One, the attacker needs to
go into the squid drawing, run past the defense,
and tap the squid's head to win. Two, the defender
must push the attacker out of the drawing to win.
Three, if there comes a situation where either one of
you can't continue playing, the last one standing wins.

Gi-hun and Sang-woo stand in the middle of the Squid Game field.

GI-HUN
What do you mean by "can't continue playing"?

MASKED SOLDIER
It refers to a player's death.

MASKED SOLDIER
Now, let the game begin.

Gi-hun and Sang-woo exchange icy stares before going to their positions on the field --


4. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPs stand before the plate glass window, looking out on the arena.

FRONT MAN (ENGLISH)
Among all the games that kids played back then,
it was the most physical and violent.

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
So any kind of violence is allowed?

FRONT MAN (ENGLISH)
Sure. There are no restrictions.
5. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD – GAME ARENA - DAY

Sang-woo stays right in the middle of the field, and he watches Gi-hun as --
Gi-hun goes to the circle part of the field, where he kneels, reties his shoes. Then he stands and --
starts hopping on one leg. Slowly, he heads for the midsection of the squid field.
Gi-hun places his foot in the small circle located in the midsection.


6. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPs look out the window to the game arena where Gi-hun is hopping on one foot.

VIP 1 (ENGLISH)
Why is he hopping on one foot?

FRONT MAN (ENGLISH)
The attacker is given a handicap. He can only
hop on one foot until he crosses the squid's neck.

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
Oh, so the defender tries to block him.

FRONT MAN (ENGLISH)
Yes. That's the first challenge of this game.


7. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD – GAME ARENA - DAY

Gi-hun stands with his foot in the small circle, and Sang-woo stands in front of Gi-hun, holding a
knife.

GI-HUN
We played this pretty often as kids.

SANG-WOO
...

GI-HUN
Do you remember what we used to say
when we crossed this?

SANG-WOO
(points his knife, marches forward)
Cut the crap and…
Sang-woo swoops in with his knife but --
Gi-hun throws the sand into Sang-woo's eyes.
Sang-woo jerks away, throws his hands to eyes, stumbles back in visible agony.
Gi-hun struts into the squid's midsection.

GI-HUN
The Secret Royal Inspector move. That's what we
called it...

INSERT -- EXT. ISLAND -- the island immobile as rough, rising waves crash against it. The sky
ominous with dark clouds as thunder RUMBLES low in the distance.


8. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPs stand in front of the plate glass window, looking down at the two men. Rain
drops start to patter against the glass.

VIP 3 (CHINESE)
Good rain knows the best time to fall.

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
Mmm. It sounds so romantic. What's it mean?

VIP 3 (ENGLISH)
"Good rain knows the best time to fall."

VIP 3 (CHINESE)
Du Fu.


9. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD - GAME ARENA - DAY

With rain falling on him, Gi-hun approaches the lower circle of the squid. Inside the
squid frame -- Sang-woo waits for Gi-hun. Knife in hand.
Genres: ["Thriller","Drama"]

Summary In the waiting area, Sang-woo and Gi-hun are chosen for the final game of Squid Game. They are assigned offense and defense roles in the Squid Game, a violent and physical game. The VIPs in the VIP room discuss the origins of the game. The Masked Soldier explains the rules to Gi-hun and Sang-woo. Gi-hun reminisces about playing the game as kids. The game begins with Gi-hun using a distraction to enter the squid's midsection. The VIPs observe the game from the VIP room. Rain starts to fall as Gi-hun progresses through the game. The scene ends with Gi-hun approaching the lower circle of the squid, where Sang-woo waits with a knife.
Strengths
  • Intense atmosphere
  • Well-developed characters
  • Tense conflict
Weaknesses
  • Limited exploration of themes
  • Moderate emotional impact

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 8

The scene effectively sets up the final game and creates a tense and suspenseful atmosphere. The violent nature of the game adds to the intensity. The nostalgic childhood memories add depth to the characters and their motivations.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game, a violent and physical game with offense and defense roles, is intriguing and unique. It adds a layer of suspense and danger to the story.

Plot: 7

The plot progresses as the final game begins and the rules are explained. The childhood memories add depth to the characters and their motivations.

Originality: 7

The level of originality in this scene is moderate. While the concept of a deadly game is not entirely unique, the specific rules and challenges of the Squid Game add a fresh approach. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 8

The characters of Gi-hun and Sang-woo are well-developed and their motivations are clear. The childhood memories add depth to their relationship.

Character Changes: 7

Gi-hun shows resourcefulness and quick thinking by using a distraction to progress in the game. Sang-woo's character remains consistent.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to win the Squid Game and survive. This reflects their deeper need for survival and their fear of death.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to tap the squid's head and win the game. This reflects the immediate challenge they are facing in the game.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Gi-hun and Sang-woo, as well as the violent nature of the game, creates a high level of conflict in the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong as the protagonist faces the challenge of overcoming the defender and tapping the squid's head. The audience is unsure of how the protagonist will succeed.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as the characters' lives are at risk in the violent game.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing the final game and setting up the conflict between Gi-hun and Sang-woo.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it includes unexpected moments, such as Gi-hun throwing sand into Sang-woo's eyes to gain an advantage. The audience is unsure of how the game will unfold.

Philosophical Conflict: 6

There is a philosophical conflict evident in this scene between the violence and physicality of the Squid Game and the protagonist's beliefs and values. The protagonist questions the violence allowed in the game.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 7

The scene evokes tension and suspense, but the emotional impact is not as strong.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue effectively conveys the rules of the game and the characters' emotions. The nostalgic conversation between Gi-hun and Sang-woo adds depth to their relationship.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it introduces the high-stakes final game of the Squid Game and creates suspense through the protagonist's actions and the intense atmosphere of the game.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by gradually building tension and suspense. The writer uses concise and impactful writing to maintain a fast pace.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It uses proper scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 9

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It introduces the setting and characters, establishes the rules of the game, and builds suspense through the protagonist's actions.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clear character motivations for Sang-woo's sudden attack on Gi-hun with a knife. It feels forced and out of place.
  • The dialogue is mostly functional and lacks depth or nuance.
  • The visual element of rain falling on Gi-hun is interesting but could be better utilized to enhance the emotional tone of the scene.
  • The pacing of the scene could be improved to build more tension and suspense leading up to the attack.
  • The exposition about the game rules and history feels clunky and could be integrated more smoothly into the dialogue and action.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more backstory or context to Sang-woo's character to make his attack on Gi-hun more believable and impactful.
  • Rewrite the dialogue to add more subtext and character development, making it more engaging for the audience.
  • Use the rain falling on Gi-hun to heighten the emotional stakes of the scene, perhaps by having it symbolize his fear or uncertainty about the game.
  • Experiment with different pacing techniques, such as slowing down the action or using quick cuts, to build more tension and suspense leading up to the attack.
  • Integrate the exposition about the game rules and history more organically into the dialogue and action, perhaps by having the characters discuss it in a more natural way.



Scene 2 - The Final Showdown
SANG-WOO
She was going to die anyway. I just chose to
end her pain quickly.

GI-HUN
Don't give me that bullshit. She was alive, and she
could have been saved.

SANG-WOO
That's why I killed her. Because I know what
you're like. Because you would've given up on
playing just to save her.

GI-HUN
Was that it? Were you afraid I'd give up?

SANG-WOO
That's right! Because if you two gave up, it
would've been all over! I'd have to leave this place
without a penny!

GI-HUN
(taking a knife out of his pocket)
If it hadn't been for her, I would've killed you
with this knife.

GI-HUN
(glaring at Sang-woo)
You are never… going to leave this place
with that money.

Gi-hun rushes towards Sang-woo. When they collide -- the two men are locked in bloody combat
right in the middle of the squid figure.
From God shot -- through the roof of the arena, the squid drawing looks like a ring fencing the two
men in.
On the field -- they lash out at each other with their knives, slashing limbs and torsos.
Blood trickles, oozes, sprays. In a battle of strength, they each grab hold of the other person's hand,
trying to subdue it. Then --
Sang-woo knocks Gi-hun's knife from his hand and throws himself against Gi-hun.
Pushed back, Gi-hun comes dangerously close to the squid line, but just in time -- he manages to
turn and get away from Sang-woo without stepping on the line.
Gi-hun seems familiar with hand to hand combat. As the fight continues, he steadily gains the
advantage by artfully dodging Sang-woo's blows and landing his own consecutive punches to
Sang-woo's face and stomach.
Sang-woo grabs his stomach in pain. Blood trickles from his lip. Gi-hun stops for just a second,
seeing Sang-woo in pain, and --
Sang-woo sees a chance. He reaches down, snatches Gi-hun's dropped knife, then stabs Gi-hun's
thigh.
Gi-hun wobbles, staggers back.
Sang-woo comes at him again, knife in hand. Gi-hun manages to get away, but before he's
completely out of reach --
Sang-woo stabs Gi-hun in the side.
Gi-hun's legs buckle, and he collapses. He grabs his side in pain.
SANG-WOO
(panting)
Do you remember this place? We played
Red Light, Green Light here. Everyone who stood
here back then is all dead now, except for you and me!

SANG-WOO
We have come too far to go back.

Gripping his knife, Sang-woo approaches Gi-hun.
Sang-woo raises his knife to stab Gi-hun but Gi-hun raises his hand to block it.
The knife lodges into Gi-hun's hand when Sang-woo brings it down, Gi-hun bites into Sang-woo’s
heel.
Gi-hun's teeth dig deeper into the flesh. Blood trickles from around the bite, then oozes, then --
Gi-hun wrenches back, completely biting, tearing off Sang-woo's Achilles heel.
Sang-woo SCREAMS in agony as his heel squirts blood onto the ground.
Gi-hun pulls the knife lodged in his hand, scrambles back, gets to his feet.
As Sang-woo writhes in pain on the ground, Gi-hun starts punching him.

GI-HUN
You killed them. You killed everyone.
You’re the one who killed them!

Gi-hun lets out a wild, animalistic cry -- "Aaarrrrgggghhh!" -- then raises the knife and plunges it
down into --
The ground. Right next to Sang-woo's ear.


10. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPs stand in front of the plate glass window, looking down at the game arena.

VIP 1 (ENGLISH)
Well, this game is over.

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
Yep, that about wraps it up.


11. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD - GAME ARENA - DAY

Gi-hun staggers to his feet, limps off, leaving Sang-woo behind him. And he's just about to step into
the squid head, past the finish line, when he -- stops.
To win, all Gi-hun has to do is step into the squid head. But he hesitates until --
GI-HUN
(softly)
I'm done…

Gi-hun slowly turns around, looks at MASKED SOLDIER 2, who's aiming a gun at
Sang-woo's head.

GI-HUN
I want to stop here.


12. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPs stand at the glass window, watching Gi-hun intently as --
He limps back to Sang-woo, who's still lying sprawled out on the field.

VIP 1 (ENGLISH)
What is he doing?

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
What the hell?

VIP 3 (ENGLISH)
What is going on?


13. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD - GAME ARENA - DAY

Gi-hun walks to the Masked Soldier.

GI-HUN
Clause Three of the agreement. Games may be
terminated if the majority agrees. If we both give up,
the game ends here.

MASKED SOLDIER 2 (ENGLISH)
(talking into his walkie-talkie)
No. 456 wants to stop the game.


14. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The VIPS stand at the glass window, watching Gi-hun.

VIP 1 (ENGLISH)
He's giving up the prize money right here
at the very edge of victory?

VIP 2 (ENGLISH)
No fucking way.

The Front Man watches Gi-hun.


15. EXT. SQUID GAME FIELD - GAME ARENA - DAY

GI-HUN
(after a moment's silence)
Sang-woo...
Genres: ["Action","Thriller"]

Summary In the midst of the Squid Game, Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death. Sang-woo reveals that he killed someone to secure his own survival, leading to a heated argument between the two. The fight escalates with both men using knives, resulting in bloody combat. Gi-hun gains the upper hand, but Sang-woo manages to stab him multiple times. However, Gi-hun retaliates by biting off Sang-woo's Achilles heel. As Sang-woo writhes in pain, Gi-hun confronts him about the deaths caused by their participation in the games. Gi-hun ultimately decides to end the game and approaches the Masked Soldier to invoke the clause for termination. The VIPs and the Front Man observe the unexpected turn of events. Gi-hun's actions leave everyone puzzled.
Strengths
  • Intense action sequences
  • Emotionally charged dialogue
  • Surprising plot twist
Weaknesses
  • Some moments of excessive violence

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly engaging and emotionally charged, with intense action and dramatic confrontations. The unexpected twist of Gi-hun's decision to stop the game adds a surprising element to the scene, leaving the audience on the edge of their seats.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game and the high-stakes competition is well-established throughout the scene. The introduction of the termination clause adds a new layer of tension and raises questions about the characters' motivations.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene revolves around the intense fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun, with the added conflict of their differing motivations and past actions. The scene progresses the overall story by showcasing the characters' desperation and the moral dilemmas they face.

Originality: 9

The level of originality in this scene is high. The concept of the Squid Game itself is unique and fresh, and the scene presents a fresh approach to the familiar trope of a final confrontation between friends turned enemies. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Sang-woo and Gi-hun are well-developed and their conflicting personalities and motivations drive the tension in the scene. Their actions and dialogue reveal their complex relationship and the moral choices they have made.

Character Changes: 8

Gi-hun experiences a significant change in his determination to stop the game and confront Sang-woo about his actions. Sang-woo, on the other hand, remains steadfast in his pursuit of survival, even at the cost of others.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to confront and defeat his former friend, Sang-woo. This reflects his deeper need for justice and revenge, as Sang-woo has betrayed and killed other participants in the game.

External Goal: 9

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to win the game by stepping into the squid head. This reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges he's facing, as it is the final step to victory.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 10

The conflict in the scene is intense and physical, with the characters fighting for their lives. The emotional conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun adds another layer of tension and raises the stakes.

Opposition: 9

The opposition in this scene is strong, as the two characters engage in a bloody and brutal fight. The audience doesn't know who will come out on top.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes in the scene are incredibly high, as the characters are fighting for their lives and the potential prize money. The decision to stop the game at the brink of victory adds an unexpected twist and raises the stakes even further.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by showcasing the characters' moral dilemmas and their ultimate decision to stop the game. It also sets up further conflicts and raises questions about the consequences of their actions.

Unpredictability: 9

This scene is unpredictable because it subverts expectations by having the protagonist give up on winning the game at the last moment. The audience doesn't know how the situation will resolve.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the clash between the protagonist's belief in justice and revenge, and the antagonist's belief in survival and self-interest. This challenges the protagonist's values and worldview, as he must decide whether to prioritize his personal vendetta or the greater good.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions through the characters' intense fight, their heated argument, and the revelation of Sang-woo's dark actions. The audience is emotionally invested in the outcome of the conflict.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is confrontational and emotionally charged, reflecting the characters' anger, betrayal, and determination. The lines effectively convey the characters' motivations and add depth to their conflict.

Engagement: 10

This scene is engaging because it is filled with intense action, emotional conflict, and high stakes. The reader or viewer is invested in the outcome of the confrontation between the two characters.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a fast and intense rhythm. The action and dialogue are well-paced, keeping the reader or viewer engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It effectively conveys the action and dialogue in a clear and concise manner.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It builds tension through escalating conflict and ends with a cliffhanger moment.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Sang-woo and Gi-hun feels a bit on-the-nose and could benefit from more subtext and nuance.
  • The fight scene is well-written and intense, but some of the descriptions of the violence may be too graphic for some readers/viewers.
  • The visual element of the squid drawing acting as a ring fencing the two men in is a bit heavy-handed and could be more subtly conveyed.
  • The VIPs' dialogue feels a bit cliched and could benefit from more unique and specific language.
  • The ending of the scene, with Gi-hun deciding to end the game, feels a bit abrupt and could benefit from more buildup and tension.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more subtext and nuance to the dialogue between Sang-woo and Gi-hun, perhaps by having them speak in more veiled terms or through nonverbal communication.
  • Consider toning down some of the descriptions of the violence in the fight scene to make it more palatable for a wider audience.
  • Consider finding a more subtle way to convey the visual element of the squid drawing acting as a ring fencing the two men in, perhaps through camera angles or lighting.
  • Consider giving the VIPs more unique and specific dialogue that helps to flesh out their characters and motivations.
  • Consider building up more tension and suspense leading up to Gi-hun's decision to end the game, perhaps by having him struggle more with the decision or by adding more obstacles in his way.



Scene 3 - The Tragic End
SANG-WOO
When we were kids, we would play just like this,
and our moms would call us in for dinner.
But no one calls us anymore.

GI-HUN
Let's go...

SANG-WOO
(tears running down his face)
...

GI-HUN
(also crying now)
Let's go home.

Gi-hun holds his hand out for Sang-woo.
Sang-woo's teary eyes look up at Gi-hun, and he raises his hand as if he’s trying to reach
Gi-hun’s hand.

SANG-WOO
Gi-hun. I’m sorry.

And without warning -- Sang-woo plunges the knife into his own neck.
Blood splashes across his face.

GI-HUN
(shocked)
Sang-woo!
He drops to his knees, takes Sang-woo in his arms.
Sang-woo coughs blood, speaks with difficulty --

GI-HUN
(crying renewed)
Sang… Sang-woo…

SANG-WOO
Gi-hun…

GI-HUN
No, Sang-woo. Don't talk.

SANG-WOO
My… My mom.

GI-HUN
No, Sang-woo…

SANG-WOO
My mom…

GI-HUN
Sang-woo…

Then -- Sang-woo dies in Gi-hun's arms.
Heavy rain falls on Gi-hun's trembling shoulders as he cries while holding the dead Sang-woo
in his arms.


16. INT. CONTROL ROOM

Sang-woo's profile block goes out; his photo drops into darkness.
Only one lit profile remains -- Gi-hun.


17. INT. DORMITORY

The electronic wall display reads ‘Number of Players - 1’, ‘Cash Prize - $44,200,000.’
The piggy bank filled with the prize money sits in the middle of the empty room.


18. INT. VIP ROOM 2

The room is empty with only the animal masks on the window frame.
19. INT. LIMOUSINE - NIGHT

Gi-hun sits with his hands and legs bound with rope.
The Front Man sits without his mask, pours himself a drink and takes a sip.

FRONT MAN
Congratulations on your win. It was quite the game.

GI-HUN
Why...?

FRONT MAN
...

GI-HUN
Why do you do this?

FRONT MAN
You like horseracing, right?

GI-HUN
...

FRONT MAN
You people are horses at a racetrack. It was unexpected.
I didn't think you'd run this far.

GI-HUN
Who are you?

FRONT MAN
Just think of all this as a dream. And not even
necessarily a nightmare. For you, at least...

The Front Man puts on his mask. Then -- gas fills up the car.

GI-HUN
(consciousness slipping)
Who are you... who... are you...?

Gi-hun blacks out.
20. EXT. CENTER OF SEOUL - NIGHT

Rain soaks the streets of central Seoul as --
A pseudo-Christian MISSIONARY tots a sign and SHOUTS at passersby --

MISSIONARY
Jesus to Heaven, non-believers to Hell! All who are
foolish and deny God, repent! The day of judgment
is coming!

A limousine pulls up to the side of the road, stops for a moment, then drives off again.
When it does --
Gi-hun -- blindfolded -- is revealed lying on the ground, not moving. The
Missionary sees him, cautiously goes over, undoes his blindfold.

MISSIONARY
Believe... in Jesus…

Gi-hun opens his eyes. They are bloodshot, tired, scared, and the Missionary steps back in surprise.
Gi-hun gags, writhes, wretches then -- a bank card comes out of his mouth.


21. INT. ATM - NIGHT

Gi-hun slowly inserts the plastic card into the ATM then presses the button to withdraw $10.
On ATM screen -- "Enter PIN Number"
Gi-hun thinks a moment then presses -- 0, 4, 5, 6.
With a WHIR AND A CLICK -- the ATM spits out $10.
Then -- on the ATM screen -- the remaining account balance is shown -- "$44,188,990."
Utterly stunned, Gi-hun stares at the screen.


22. EXT. CHO'S FISHMONGER - MARKETPLACE - NIGHT

It's late. Gi-hun limps through the nearly-deserted marketplace.

SANG-WOO'S MOM (O.C.)
Gi-hun!

Gi-hun stops walking.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
(gasps)
What happened to you? Did you get drunk
and fight again?
GI-HUN


SANG-WOO'S MOM
Wait here.

Sang-woo's Mom turns, rushes into her store, comes back moments later with a bag full of
chopped fish.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
I packed some mackerel. Go have some with your mom.
She must be sick. She won't pick up her phone,
and she hasn't come out to work for two days now.
I should've stopped by, but I've been so out of it lately.

Gi-hun takes the bag then fishes his $10 from his pocket, hands it to her.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
That's okay. If you have any money, save it
and give it to your mother.

Sang-woo's Mom bids farewell, turns to go back to the store, but stops in her way to look back at
Gi-hun.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
Gi-hun.
Genres: ["Drama","Thriller"]

Summary In the midst of the Squid Game, Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death. Sang-woo reveals that he killed someone to secure his own survival, leading to a heated argument between the two. The fight escalates with both men using knives, resulting in bloody combat. Gi-hun gains the upper hand, but Sang-woo manages to stab him multiple times. However, Gi-hun retaliates by biting off Sang-woo's Achilles heel. As Sang-woo writhes in pain, Gi-hun confronts him about the deaths caused by their participation in the games. Gi-hun ultimately decides to end the game and approaches the Masked Soldier to invoke the clause for termination. The VIPs and the Front Man observe the unexpected turn of events. Gi-hun's actions leave everyone puzzled.
Strengths "The scene is emotionally charged, with intense action and a shocking twist. The dialogue is powerful and the performances are compelling. The tragic nature of the scene leaves a lasting impact on the audience."
Weaknesses "Some viewers may find the violence and bloodshed in the scene disturbing. The scene may also be emotionally overwhelming for some audience members."

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful and emotionally charged, with intense action and a shocking twist. It effectively conveys the tragic nature of the story and leaves a lasting impression on the audience.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game and the moral dilemmas faced by the characters are compelling and thought-provoking. The scene explores the consequences of their choices and the depths they are willing to go to survive.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is gripping and filled with tension. The fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun adds a layer of conflict and raises the stakes. The unexpected twist of Sang-woo taking his own life adds a tragic element to the story.

Originality: 9

This scene is fairly original in its depiction of a character taking their own life as a result of the game they have been forced to participate in. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality of the scene.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Sang-woo and Gi-hun are well-developed and their emotional journey is compelling. The scene showcases their complex relationship and the internal struggles they face.

Character Changes: 9

The scene marks a significant change in Gi-hun's character as he confronts the consequences of his actions and decides to end the game. Sang-woo's death also represents a major character change.

Internal Goal: 10

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to apologize and express his remorse to his friend, Sang-woo, before taking his own life. This reflects his deeper need for forgiveness and his fear of the consequences of his actions.

External Goal: 8

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is not explicitly stated, but it can be inferred that he wants to end his suffering and escape the dangerous game he has been forced to participate in.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict in the scene is intense and physical, with the characters fighting for their lives. The emotional conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun adds another layer of tension.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong, as the protagonist faces internal conflict and the external challenge of the dangerous game he is participating in.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes in the scene are incredibly high, with the characters fighting for their lives and facing the consequences of their choices. The outcome of the fight and Gi-hun's decision to end the game have far-reaching implications.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by resolving the conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun and setting up the next phase of the narrative. It also raises questions about the true nature of the Squid Game.

Unpredictability: 10

This scene is unpredictable because the protagonist unexpectedly takes his own life, which is a shocking and unexpected turn of events.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

There is a philosophical conflict evident in this scene between the protagonist's belief in the value of life and the game's organizers who see the participants as disposable and expendable.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene is highly emotional and evokes strong reactions from the audience. The tragic death of Sang-woo and Gi-hun's grief leave a lasting impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is emotional and impactful. It effectively conveys the characters' pain, regret, and desperation. The final exchange between Gi-hun and Sang-woo is particularly powerful.

Engagement: 10

This scene is engaging because it is emotionally charged and contains a shocking and unexpected twist.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by building tension and suspense leading up to the shocking moment when the protagonist takes his own life.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre, with proper use of dialogue and action lines.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings and action lines.


Critique
  • The dialogue between Sang-woo and Gi-hun feels a bit generic and lacks depth. It could benefit from more specific and meaningful exchanges that reveal their characters and their relationship.
  • The emotional impact of Sang-woo stabbing himself is somewhat diminished by the lack of build-up and foreshadowing. It feels sudden and out of nowhere. Adding subtle hints or clues throughout the screenplay leading up to this moment could make it more impactful.
  • The scene could benefit from more sensory details to enhance the atmosphere and immerse the audience in the tragic moment. Describing the sound of rain, the smell of wet earth, or the taste of blood could add depth to the scene.
  • The dialogue between Gi-hun and Sang-woo after the stabbing feels a bit repetitive and could be condensed to maintain the emotional intensity without dragging the scene.
  • The visual element of blood splashing across Sang-woo's face is powerful, but it could be further emphasized through vivid and visceral descriptions to evoke a stronger reaction from the audience.
  • The ending of the scene, with Sang-woo dying in Gi-hun's arms as heavy rain falls, is poignant and tragic. However, it could benefit from a stronger closing image or moment that lingers in the audience's mind.
  • The transition to the next scene could be smoother and more seamless to maintain the flow of the story.
Suggestions
  • Develop more unique and specific dialogue that reveals the characters' personalities, histories, and conflicts.
  • Foreshadow Sang-woo's self-destructive tendencies and inner turmoil throughout the screenplay to make his self-stabbing more impactful.
  • Add sensory details to enhance the atmosphere and immerse the audience in the tragic moment.
  • Condense the dialogue between Gi-hun and Sang-woo after the stabbing to maintain the emotional intensity.
  • Amplify the description of the blood splashing across Sang-woo's face to evoke a stronger reaction from the audience.
  • Consider adding a powerful closing image or moment that leaves a lasting impression on the audience.
  • Smoothly transition to the next scene to maintain the flow of the story.



Scene 4 - Gi-hun's Tragic Reunion
GI-HUN


SANG-WOO'S MOM
Have you heard from Sang-woo recently?

GI-HUN


SANG-WOO'S MOM
Nevermind. Get going.


23. INT. LIVING ROOM - GI-HUN'S HOME - NIGHT

With the plastic bag in his hand, Gi-hun opens the door to his semi-basement apartment, enters the
living room. All the lights are out. There's no sign of anyone home.
GI-HUN
Mom? I’m home.

GI-HUN
Mom?


24. INT. BEDROOM - GI-HUN'S HOME - NIGHT

Gi-hun enters the room, sees --
Gi-hun's Mom lying on the hard, bare floor. Motionless.

GI-HUN
Mom, are you sleeping?

Gi-hun cautiously approaches his mom, studies her still, emaciated body.

GI-HUN
Mom…

GI-HUN
Mom, I’m home.

GI-HUN
Mom?

Gi-hun checks his mother's breathing -- none. He touches her face -- ice cold.

GI-HUN
Mom...

GI-HUN
Open your eyes.

GI-HUN
Mom, I’m home.

GI-HUN
I made some money.

Gi-hun lies down next to his mother, holding her like he would have done as a child - soft
sobbing fills the semi-basement room.

FADE OUT.
25. INT. SUBWAY CAR

SUPER: "1 YEAR LATER"

Gi-hun sits with a blank expression as the swaying subway car SCREECHES along its track.
With his unkempt, uncut hair and his shabby clothes, Gi-hun pretty much looks like a homeless
person. The other PASSENGERS around him keep their distance.


26. INT. BANK BRANCH MANAGER'S OFFICE - DAY

In the neat office, Gi-hun sits across from the middle-aged MANAGER who's dressed in a spiffy
suit. The Manager is trying to size Gi-hun up, since his appearance is so uncouth.

MANAGER
One of our staff is a certified barista, and he made
it himself. I'm not sure if you'd like it, though.

GI-HUN
Why did you ask to see me?

MANAGER
Yes, I'm sorry for asking you to come all the way
out here. We wanted to send you a car but -

GI-HUN
Why did you ask to see me?

MANAGER
Well, sir... it's been nearly a year since you deposited
your money into our bank, but you haven't said
anything about it.

GI-HUN
What is there for me to say?

MANAGER
Oh, no, no. That's not what I mean. Currently, the
money is in a regular account, which means it accrues
hardly any interest at all. Our bank recently started
a new service for VIP members like yourself,
so I wanted to introduce you to it, as well as
take the opportunity to say hello. That's why I asked
you to come. And no doubt, interrupted your busy
schedule.

Gi-hun slowly stands up.

MANAGER
Sir... is something wrong?

GI-HUN
Can I ask you a favor?

MANAGER
Of course.

GI-HUN
Can you lend me 10 bucks?

MANAGER
(surprised)
Um... yeah... sure.

The Manager pulls a $10 bill from his pocket, gives it to Gi-hun.
Gi-hun takes the cash and leaves. The Manager looks dumbfounded.


27. EXT. RIVERSIDE - NIGHT

It's late, Gi-hun is sitting on the riverside drinking soju alone.

OLD LADY (O.C.)
Excuse me.

Gi-hun turns his head.

OLD LADY
Please buy some flowers.

GI-HUN
...

OLD LADY
Please. These will all end up wilting
if I don't sell them by the end of today.

Gi-hun hands money to the old lady.
OLD LADY
Thank you. Thank you.

The old lady puts down a flower on the ground next to Gi-hun, and leaves. Gi-hun looks down and
sees – the message card wrapped in black and pink.
Shocked, Gi-hun opens the envelope, takes out the card which reads, “December 24, 11:30 P.M. Sky
Building, 7th Floor. From your Gganbu.”


28. EXT. STREET - NIGHT

Gi-hun looks up at the high-rise buildings surrounding him, and walks to enter one.


29. INT. PRIVATE HOSPITAL ROOM - NIGHT

Gi-hun takes the elevator to the 7th floor.
He enters a large, spacious room with a hospital bed at a corner. An old man lies in the bed. He's
attached to various medical equipment. He's looking out the window.
Gi-hun walks to the bed but stops when he finally sees the old man's face. Or rather, recognizes
it.
Il-nam.
Gi-hun is stunned and speechless.

IL-NAM
Could you get me some water?

GI-HUN


IL-NAM
Please.

Gi-hun pours water in a crystal glass, hands it to Il-nam.
He drinks it with difficulty before lying back, looking out the window again.

GI-HUN
Who are you?
Genres: ["Drama","Thriller"]

Summary Gi-hun returns home to find his mother dead, leading him to a downward spiral of homelessness and despair. A year later, he encounters a mysterious message that leads him to a private hospital room where he discovers Il-nam, the old man from the Squid Game. The scene explores themes of loss, redemption, and the consequences of participating in the deadly games.
Strengths
  • Emotional impact
  • Character development
  • Plot progression
Weaknesses
  • Limited dialogue

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is emotionally impactful and effectively conveys the tragic consequences of the Squid Game. It introduces a new twist and raises intriguing questions about the characters' past and future.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of exploring the aftermath of the Squid Game and the unexpected reunion between Gi-hun and Il-nam adds depth and complexity to the story.

Plot: 8

The plot of the scene focuses on Gi-hun's personal journey and his encounter with Il-nam, providing a compelling continuation of the overall story.

Originality: 6

The level of originality in this scene is moderate. While the concept of a struggling protagonist searching for his mother is not entirely unique, the specific details and the emotional depth of the scene add freshness to the familiar situation. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue also contributes to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The scene delves into Gi-hun's emotional state and showcases his resilience and determination despite his tragic circumstances. The introduction of Il-nam adds a layer of mystery and intrigue.

Character Changes: 9

Gi-hun undergoes a significant change as he confronts his past and makes a decision to seek redemption by helping Il-nam.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to find his mother and reconnect with her. This reflects his deeper need for love, belonging, and a sense of family.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to find a job and improve his financial situation. This reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges he is facing as a homeless person.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 9

The conflict between Gi-hun's internal struggles and his encounter with Il-nam creates tension and drives the emotional intensity of the scene.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong as the protagonist faces multiple challenges, including the loss of his mother, his financial struggles, and the uncertainty of his future. The audience is unsure of how he will overcome these obstacles.

High Stakes: 9

The stakes are high as Gi-hun grapples with the loss of his mother, his own homelessness, and the potential for a new path through his encounter with Il-nam.

Story Forward: 8

The scene moves the story forward by introducing a new direction and raising questions about the characters' past and future.

Unpredictability: 7

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces unexpected elements, such as the protagonist finding his mother's lifeless body and encountering a mysterious message. These elements create intrigue and keep the audience guessing about what will happen next.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

There is a philosophical conflict evident in this scene between the protagonist's desire for a better life and his current circumstances of poverty and despair. This challenges his beliefs about the fairness of the world and the possibility of upward mobility.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene evokes strong emotions through its portrayal of Gi-hun's grief and despair, as well as the unexpected reunion with Il-nam.

Dialogue: 7

The dialogue in the scene effectively conveys the characters' emotions and reveals important information about their past experiences.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it creates a sense of mystery and emotional investment in the protagonist's journey. The reader is compelled to find out what happened to the protagonist's mother and how he will overcome his challenges.

Pacing: 8

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by gradually building tension and suspense. The slower moments, such as the protagonist's interaction with his mother's body, are balanced with faster-paced moments, such as the encounter with the bank manager.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It uses proper scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It begins with a setup of the protagonist's current situation, introduces a conflict, and ends with a cliffhanger that leads into the next scene.


Critique
  • The scene lacks clear transitions between locations, making it confusing for the reader to follow.
  • There is repetition in the dialogue, particularly with Gi-hun repeatedly calling out for his mother.
  • The emotional impact of Gi-hun finding his mother dead is undermined by the lack of description and focus on his reaction.
  • The dialogue between Gi-hun and the bank manager feels forced and unnatural.
  • The interaction with the old lady selling flowers feels disconnected from the rest of the scene and lacks purpose.
  • The revelation of Il-nam in the hospital room lacks buildup and explanation.
  • The scene lacks a clear narrative purpose and does not advance the overall story or character development significantly.
Suggestions
  • Provide clear transitions between locations to help the reader follow the scene.
  • Condense and revise the repetitive dialogue to make it more impactful and concise.
  • Focus on Gi-hun's emotional reaction to finding his mother dead, describing his grief and devastation in detail.
  • Rewrite the dialogue between Gi-hun and the bank manager to make it more natural and believable.
  • Integrate the interaction with the old lady selling flowers more seamlessly into the scene, giving it a clearer purpose or connection to the overall story.
  • Build up the revelation of Il-nam in the hospital room, providing more context and explanation for his presence.
  • Ensure that the scene has a clear narrative purpose and contributes to the overall story or character development.



Scene 5 - The Final Game
IL-NAM
You see that man over there... perhaps he's drunk,
but he's been like that for hours. He looks like
a homeless man.
Through the window --
Outside in the street -- snow is falling. A MAN sits on the ground, slumped against a street
lamp.
GI-HUN
Were you behind everything?

Outside in the street -- the man slowly slumps to the ground. PEDESTRIANS hurry by, avoiding the
fallen man.

IL-NAM
He'll soon freeze to death if he stays out there.
But no one is coming to help him...

GI-HUN
Why did you do it?

IL-NAM
(looks at Gi-hun)
What would you do?

GI-HUN
Answer me! Why did you do something like that?

IL-NAM
Would you stop and help that smelly,
human piece of trash?

GI-HUN
Who are you? Why did you let me live?

IL-NAM
Play another game with me.

IL-NAM
(looks out the window again)
If that man is still there by midnight, I win.
If somebody helps him, you win.

Suddenly -- Gi-hun leans forward, wraps his hands around Il-nam's neck.

GI-HUN
Stop talking nonsense. I can kill you right this instant.

IL-NAM
If you do that, you'll never get an answer from me.
GI-HUN
...

IL-NAM
If you play the game, I'll answer your questions.

Gi-hun loosens his grip on Il-nam's neck.
He looks outside the window, then at the clock -- an old-fashioned antique –
11:30PM.
After a brief pause --

GI-HUN
If you lose, I kill you with my own hands.

IL-NAM
Then what will you wager?

GI-HUN
Anything. You can take everything from me
if you want anyway.

TIME LAPSE OF -- the wall clock shows 11:45. Through the window -- outside in the street -- not
many people out, but those who are rush along with their hands in their pockets, paying no mind to
the man lying motionless and exposed in the falling snow.

GI-HUN
Who are you?

IL-NAM
I make money with money.

GI-HUN
Do you make money so easily that
you do something like that?

IL-NAM
Money. You know what making money is like.
It's not so easy to make money, is it?

GI-HUN
How much of what you're saying is true and how
much is false? Oh Il-nam... is that even your real
name?
IL-NAM
Yes, it is. It's also true that I have a lump in my
head. And, back in the day, I once lived in a house
in an alley just like that one with my wife and son.

Suddenly -- outside in the street -- a PASSERBY approaches the fallen man. He tries shaking
him awake.
Il-nam watches the scene through the window, his face suddenly intense.
Back outside in the street -- the Passerby sees the fallen man is unresponsive, looks around, then
starts going through the man's pockets. Not finding anything, he walks off.
Il-nam turns back to Gi-hun, who looks sad, if not despairing.

IL-NAM
Do you… still believe in people?
Even after what you've been through?

GI-HUN
Why did you want to see me?

IL-NAM
I heard you haven't touched your prize money
and have gone back to living your old life.
Is it because you feel guilty?

GI-HUN
Guilty? I don’t think that’s for you to say.

IL-NAM
That money was the reward you got for your luck
and hard work. You have the right to use it.

IL-NAM
Look at me. Life is…short.

The wall clock shows 11:55.

GI-HUN
Why did you do such a thing?

IL-NAM
Do you know what people without money and
people with money have in common?

GI-HUN
...
IL-NAM
Living is no fun for them. If you have
too much money, no matter what you buy, eat or
drink, in the end, it all becomes boring.

GI-HUN
...

IL-NAM
At some point, my clients began to tell me
the same thing. That they had no joy in life anymore.
So we all got together and did some pondering.
What can we do to have some fun?

GI-HUN
Fun? You put us through it for fun?

IL-NAM
It seems like you’ve forgotten. I never forced
anyone to play that game. You also ended up
coming back of your own accord.
Genres: ["Drama","Thriller"]

Summary In the midst of the Squid Game, Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death. Sang-woo reveals that he killed someone to secure his own survival, leading to a heated argument between the two. The fight escalates with both men using knives, resulting in bloody combat. Gi-hun gains the upper hand, but Sang-woo manages to stab him multiple times. However, Gi-hun retaliates by biting off Sang-woo's Achilles heel. As Sang-woo writhes in pain, Gi-hun confronts him about the deaths caused by their participation in the games. Gi-hun ultimately decides to end the game and approaches the Masked Soldier to invoke the clause for termination. The VIPs and the Front Man observe the unexpected turn of events. Gi-hun's actions leave everyone puzzled.
Strengths "The scene is highly intense and emotionally charged, with a gripping plot and well-developed characters. The dialogue is confrontational and thought-provoking, and the themes explored add depth to the story."
Weaknesses "The scene may be too violent and intense for some viewers, and the resolution of the conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun may leave some questions unanswered."

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly intense and emotionally charged, with a shocking revelation and a pivotal decision made by the protagonist. The brutal fight and the confrontation between the characters create a high level of tension and suspense.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game and the moral dilemmas faced by the characters are intriguing and thought-provoking. The revelation of Sang-woo's dark secret adds depth to the story and raises ethical questions about survival and the consequences of one's actions.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is gripping and intense, with the fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun serving as a climax to their conflict. The revelation of Sang-woo's secret and Gi-hun's decision to end the game add significant twists and turns to the story.

Originality: 9

The scene introduces a unique concept of a deadly game and explores the moral dilemmas faced by the characters. The dialogue feels authentic and reveals the complexities of the characters' motivations.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Sang-woo and Gi-hun are well-developed and their conflict is deeply rooted in their personal motivations and past actions. The scene showcases their complex relationship and the emotional turmoil they experience.

Character Changes: 8

Gi-hun experiences a significant character change in this scene, as he confronts Sang-woo about the consequences of their actions and decides to end the game. Sang-woo also undergoes a change as his dark secret is revealed and he faces the consequences of his actions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to challenge the beliefs and values of the other character, Gi-hun. Il-nam wants to make Gi-hun question his own morality and view of humanity.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to make a wager with Gi-hun. Il-nam wants to play another game with Gi-hun and offers a bet that if someone helps the homeless man by midnight, Gi-hun wins.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 10

The conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun reaches its peak in this scene, with a brutal fight to the death and a heated argument. The stakes are high and the tension is palpable.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in the scene is strong, as Gi-hun challenges Il-nam's beliefs and confronts him about his actions. The audience is unsure of how the confrontation will unfold.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes are extremely high in this scene, as the characters fight for their lives and confront the consequences of their actions. The outcome of the fight and Gi-hun's decision to end the game have far-reaching implications.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by resolving the conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun and setting up the next phase of the narrative. Gi-hun's decision to end the game has significant implications for the plot.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces a wager and leaves the audience uncertain about the outcome. The characters' actions and dialogue keep the audience guessing.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the contrast between Il-nam's belief in the inherent goodness of people and Gi-hun's skepticism and cynicism towards humanity. This challenges Gi-hun's worldview and forces him to question his own beliefs.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions of sadness, despair, and conflict. The intense fight and the revelation of Sang-woo's secret create a powerful emotional impact.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is intense and confrontational, reflecting the emotional state of the characters. The conversation between Sang-woo and Gi-hun reveals important information and adds depth to their relationship.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it presents a moral dilemma and raises thought-provoking questions about human nature. The dialogue and tension between the characters keep the audience invested in the outcome.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene is effective in building tension and maintaining the audience's interest. The dialogue and actions are well-timed and contribute to the overall rhythm of the scene.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The scene follows the expected format for its genre, with clear scene headings, character names, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The scene follows a clear structure with a setup, conflict, and resolution. It effectively builds tension and advances the narrative.


Critique
  • The scene starts with a strong visual of snow falling outside, which sets a somber and reflective tone. However, the dialogue in the beginning feels a bit repetitive and could be condensed to make the scene more concise.
  • The conflict between Il-nam and Gi-hun's differing views on the value of human life is intriguing, but it could be further developed and explored. The dialogue could delve deeper into their contrasting perspectives and create more tension.
  • The introduction of the passerby trying to help the homeless man adds an interesting element to the scene, but it feels a bit rushed and could be given more attention. It would be beneficial to show the passerby's reaction and emotions more clearly.
  • The dialogue between Il-nam and Gi-hun about money and life is thought-provoking, but it could benefit from more nuance and depth. It feels a bit on-the-nose and could be more subtly woven into the conversation.
  • The revelation of Il-nam's personal history and his connection to Gi-hun adds an emotional layer to the scene, but it could be further explored and expanded upon. It would be impactful to delve into their shared experiences and how it has shaped their perspectives.
  • The scene ends with the wall clock showing 11:55, which creates a sense of impending climax. However, the final lines of dialogue feel a bit abrupt and could be rephrased to create a stronger ending.
Suggestions
  • Condense the initial dialogue to make it more concise and impactful.
  • Further develop the conflict between Il-nam and Gi-hun's differing views on the value of human life.
  • Give more attention to the passerby trying to help the homeless man, showing their reaction and emotions more clearly.
  • Add more nuance and depth to the dialogue about money and life, weaving it more subtly into the conversation.
  • Expand upon the revelation of Il-nam's personal history and his connection to Gi-hun, exploring their shared experiences and how it has shaped their perspectives.
  • Rephrase the final lines of dialogue to create a stronger ending.



Scene 6 - The Final Showdown
Il-nam turns, looks --
Outside in the street -- the fallen man. White snow piling on his body.
The wall clock hits 11:58, and the second hand TICK TOCKS, TICK TOCKS…

IL-NAM
Your luck seems to have run out...
Do you still believe in people?

GI-HUN
(voice shaking)
Why did you join the game?

IL-NAM
(breathing heavily)
When I was a child, I had so much fun no matter
what I did with my friends that I lost track of time.
I wanted to feel the same feeling one more time
before I die. It's not something you can feel while
watching as a spectator. I wanted that feeling.

GI-HUN
So? Did it feel good?
IL-NAM
You asked me why I let you live.
Because it was fun playing with you.

Il-nam's eyes seem to lose focus, and he turns, looks out the window again.
The seconds TICK TOCK on -- 11:59 now -- only 1 minute left.

IL-NAM
Thanks to you, I managed to remember things from
my past, things I'd completely forgotten about.

GI-HUN
...

IL-NAM
(voice softening)
It’d been such a long time since I’d had that much fun.

With only 10 seconds remaining, Gi-hun looks through the window at --
Outside in the street -- the fallen man blanketed with snow. No other people in sight.
Until -- the Passerby who rummaged through the fallen man's pockets reappears, followed by a
POLICEMAN. Both men lift the fallen man up.

GI-HUN
They’re here. People came to help.

The wall clock strikes midnight, and its bell CHIMES.
Gi-hun looks at Il-nam, sees -- he's dead. With his eyes open.
BEEEEE -- his heart monitor flatlines.

GI-HUN
You saw it, didn’t you?

He looks blankly at the dead Il-nam.

GI-HUN
You lost.

Gi-hun's face twists with emotion as the antique clock’s bell CHIMES ON.


30. I/E. PRIVATE HOSPITAL ROOM/STREET - NIGHT (LATER)

The Front Man slowly stretches out his hand and closes Il-nam's eyes.
INSERT -- FLASHBACK -- INT. FRONT MAN’S ROOM –

Il-nam puts down his mask on the table.

IL-NAM
You attend to the guests for me.

FRONT MAN
May I ask why?

IL-NAM
Because there's no way watching it can be
more fun than playing it yourself.


The Front Man stares at his reflection on the window and slowly walks away.


31. INT. HAIR SALON - DAY

A salon off a suburban street.
From a TV hanging on the wall -- a news broadcast is heard. A record number of household debt
due to an economic downturn.
Gi-hun sits in a chair, his long hair disheveled and bushy around his face. A
HAIRDRESSER (middle-aged female) drapes a gown over his front.

HAIRDRESSER
You've got quite a lot of hair going on here. What
would you like to do to it?

GI-HUN
….

HAIRDRESSER
Do you want to cut it short? Or if you're growing it out,
do you want it permed?

Gi-hun glances around, sees a photo of a red-haired model hanging on the salon wall.


32. I/E. ORPHANAGE/DORM - DAY

The dorm is a small room with beds in it.
Gi-hun -- now in proper clothes and sporting his flashy, new, red hairdo -- sits across from Cheol,
Sae-byeok's younger brother.

GI-HUN
You must be Cheol. You look a lot like your sister.

CHEOL
(eyes him)
Mister. Do you know my sister?

GI-HUN
(after a brief pause)
I’m a friend of hers.

CHEOL
Then do you know where she is?

On a table nearby -- a photo of Sae-byeok and Cheol together. Sae-byeok smiles brightly in the
photo.


33. I/E. FISH BUN CART - AFTERNOON

Sang-woo's Mom makes fish buns by the roadside. Sensing someone's presence, she turns, sees
--
Gi-hun. Holding luggage in one hand and Cheol's hand in the other.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
Is this the boy?

GI-HUN
(nodding)
Yes.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
(to Cheol)
What's your name?

CHEOL
Cheol, I’m Kang Cheol...

Sang-woo's Mom pats Cheol’s head.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
Kang Cheol? Goodness, you have a very manly name.
And you look like a tough boy too.
GI-HUN
Please look after him.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
All right. It’s only another spoon on my table.
Don't worry, and have a great trip.

GI-HUN
Okay.

Gi-hun pats Cheol’s head, turns and leaves.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
(to Cheol)
Have you eaten?

CHEOL
(shakes his head)


SANG-WOO'S MOM
Goodness, come and take a seat. I’ll give you
a fish bun. Eat up.
Genres: ["Thriller","Drama"]

Summary In the midst of the Squid Game, Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death. Sang-woo reveals his dark secret, leading to a heated argument. The fight escalates with both men using knives, resulting in bloody combat. Gi-hun gains the upper hand but is stabbed multiple times. However, Gi-hun retaliates by biting off Sang-woo's Achilles heel. As Sang-woo writhes in pain, Gi-hun confronts him about the deaths caused by the games. Gi-hun decides to end the game and approaches the Masked Soldier. The unexpected turn of events leaves everyone puzzled.
Strengths "The scene is filled with intense action, emotional depth, and thought-provoking dialogue. The performances of the actors are strong, and the pacing keeps the audience engaged."
Weaknesses "Some viewers may find the violence and brutality of the fight scene disturbing. The scene may also be confusing for those who have not watched the previous episodes of the series."

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is intense, emotionally charged, and reveals important information about the characters and their motivations. The fight sequence is well-executed and keeps the audience on the edge of their seats. The unexpected decision by Gi-hun adds a layer of intrigue and leaves the audience wanting to know what will happen next.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game, where participants compete in deadly games for a chance to win a large sum of money, is unique and intriguing. The scene effectively showcases the brutal nature of the games and the moral dilemmas faced by the characters.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is gripping and moves the story forward significantly. The fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun reveals important character dynamics and sets up the climax of the story. Gi-hun's decision to end the game adds a twist to the plot and raises questions about the outcome.

Originality: 7

The level of originality in this scene is moderate. While the concept of a deadly game is not entirely unique, the specific circumstances and character interactions provide a fresh approach. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue adds to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Sang-woo and Gi-hun are well-developed and their conflict in this scene adds depth to their arcs. The scene also introduces the mysterious character of Il-nam, who later becomes a key figure in the story. The emotional impact of the scene is heightened by the strong performances of the actors.

Character Changes: 8

Gi-hun undergoes a significant change in this scene, as he confronts Sang-woo about the deaths caused by their participation in the games and decides to end the game. Sang-woo's character also experiences a change, as his dark secret is revealed and he faces the consequences of his actions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to understand why Il-nam let him live and to make sense of their interactions throughout the game. This reflects Gi-hun's deeper need for meaning and connection in his life.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to survive the game and win the prize money. This reflects the immediate circumstances and challenges he is facing.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 10

The conflict in the scene is intense and physical, as Sang-woo and Gi-hun fight for their lives. The emotional conflict between the characters is also palpable, as they confront each other about their past actions and the deaths caused by the games.

Opposition: 7

The opposition in this scene is moderate. While there is a small obstacle in the form of the fallen man, the audience is unsure of how it will be resolved and what impact it will have on the protagonist.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes in the scene are incredibly high, as Sang-woo and Gi-hun fight for their lives. The decision to end the game also has far-reaching consequences for the characters and the overall outcome of the story.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward significantly, as Gi-hun's decision to end the game sets up the climax and resolution of the story. The introduction of Il-nam and the revelation of Sang-woo's secret also add new layers to the narrative.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces new elements, such as the fallen man and the passerby, that create uncertainty and raise questions about the direction of the story.

Philosophical Conflict: 9

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the question of whether people can be trusted and if there is inherent goodness in humanity. This challenges Gi-hun's beliefs and values, as he is forced to confront the actions and motivations of Il-nam.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 9

The scene evokes strong emotions in the audience, as they witness the brutal fight and confrontations between the characters. The revelation of Sang-woo's dark secret and Gi-hun's decision to end the game add layers of complexity and emotional depth to the scene.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is intense and reveals important information about the characters' motivations and past experiences. The conversation between Gi-hun and Il-nam adds depth to their relationship and raises philosophical questions about the nature of the games.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it creates suspense and intrigue through its descriptive narrative and dialogue. The reader is drawn into the mystery of Il-nam's motivations and the outcome of the game.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by creating a sense of tension and suspense. The use of short, impactful dialogue and descriptive narrative keeps the reader engaged and wanting to know more.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It includes proper use of scene headings, action lines, and dialogue formatting.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It includes clear scene headings, concise action lines, and dialogue that advances the plot and reveals character motivations.


Critique
  • The scene starts with a strong visual image of the fallen man in the street, covered in snow. This sets a somber and tense tone for the scene.
  • The dialogue between Il-nam and Gi-hun is meaningful and reveals more about their characters and motivations.
  • The use of the ticking clock and the passing of time adds to the tension and suspense of the scene.
  • The emotional impact of Il-nam's death is effectively conveyed through Gi-hun's reaction and the flatlining heart monitor.
  • The transition to the next scenes is smooth and allows for a sense of closure and new beginnings for Gi-hun.
  • The inclusion of the news broadcast about household debt adds a layer of social commentary and context to the story.
  • The interaction between Gi-hun and Cheol at the orphanage dorm is touching and shows Gi-hun's growth and willingness to help others.
  • The reunion between Gi-hun and Sang-woo's Mom at the fish bun cart is a heartwarming moment that brings closure to their relationship.
  • Overall, the scene effectively conveys the themes of life, death, and redemption, and sets up the next chapter of Gi-hun's journey.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding more visual descriptions to enhance the atmosphere and mood of the scene, such as the sound of the snow crunching under the Passerby's feet or the dimly lit hospital room.
  • Explore deeper into the philosophical conversation between Il-nam and Gi-hun, delving into their contrasting views on the value of human life and the consequences of their actions.
  • Provide more insight into Gi-hun's emotional state after witnessing the Passerby and Policeman helping the fallen man, as this is a pivotal moment in the scene.
  • Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Gi-hun after Il-nam's death, allowing the audience to fully absorb the impact of the loss.
  • Further develop the relationship between Gi-hun and Cheol, perhaps through a conversation about Sae-byeok and their shared memories.
  • Consider adding a small gesture or action from Gi-hun to show his gratitude towards Sang-woo's Mom for taking care of Cheol.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating a symbolic element or motif throughout the scene to reinforce the themes and emotions, such as the recurring sound of the clock ticking or the presence of water as a symbol of life and renewal.
  • Consider adding a brief moment of reflection for Gi-hun after Il-nam's death, allowing the audience to fully absorb the impact of the loss.
  • Further develop the relationship between Gi-hun and Cheol, perhaps through a conversation about Sae-byeok and their shared memories.
  • Consider adding a small gesture or action from Gi-hun to show his gratitude towards Sang-woo's Mom for taking care of Cheol.
  • Explore the possibility of incorporating a symbolic element or motif throughout the scene to reinforce the themes and emotions, such as the recurring sound of the clock ticking or the presence of water as a symbol of life and renewal.



Scene 7 - The Revelation and Departure
SANG-WOO'S MOM
You're dressed too lightly in this cold weather.
Don't you have a warmer jacket?

She grabs the luggage, it's heavy. She opens it and -- inside -- stacks and stacks of cash. Plus --
A note: "This is money I borrowed from Sang-woo."
Sang-woo's Mom is stunned. She rushes to find Gi-hun, but he's long gone.

SANG-WOO'S MOM
Gi-hun. Gi-hun!


34. INT. ARRIVALS SUBWAY PLATFORM/DEPARTURES SUBWAY PLATFORM - ICN
AIRPORT - DAY

Gi-hun steps off the train with his luggage. He proceeds down the platform, talking on the phone.


GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Hey, Dad's almost at the airport now.
I'll board the flight soon.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Of course, I bought a present for you.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
(chuckles softly)
No. It's a secret. I'll show it to you in person.

Someone shouts in a loud voice, and Gi-hun stops to look at the opposite platform.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Hold on, Ga-yeong.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Ga-yeong, I'll call you again once I get there.
I love you too.

Gi-hun watches, finally sees --
Two men are playing the ddakji game. One of the men is the Suited Man Gi-hun originally
played ddakji with. And he appears to be winning because -- he slaps a MAN IN A JUMPER
across the face. Hard.

MAN IN A JUMPER
(after getting hit)
Let's play another round. Now!

Suddenly -- the Suited Man looks over, sees Gi-hun watching him. A brief silence passes before --
Gi-hun starts running.
MOMENTS LATER -- on the departures subway platform -- Gi-hun arrives -- just as the Suited
Man rides off on a leaving subway.
Panting, Gi-hun approaches the Man in a Jumper, snatches the business card that he now holds in his
hand.

MAN IN A JUMPER
What the hell are you doing?

Gi-hun eyes the card with the circle, triangle, and square.

MAN IN A JUMPER
Give that back!

GI-HUN
(pushing the man to the wall)
No! Never!
35. INT. LOBBY - ICN - DAY

The airport lobby is crowded with PEOPLE. Gi-hun sits on a bench with the card and his cell
phone in his hands.

ANNOUNCER (V.O.)
All boarding for U-Way flight 202 to Los Angeles
will close shortly.


36. INT. BOARDING GATE - ICN - DAY

Gi-hun is walking to board the plane. He stops and makes a call.

VOICE (V.O.) (FROM PHONE)
Do you wish to participate in the game?
If you wish to play, state your name and date of birth.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Seong Gi-hun. October 31, 1974.

GI-HUN (INTO PHONE)
Listen carefully. I’m not a horse. I’m a person.
That’s why I want to know who you people are and
how you can commit such atrocities against people.

FRONT MAN (V.O.)
Player 456. Don't get any absurd ideas.

GI-HUN
That's why I can't forgive you for everything you're doing.

FRONT MAN (V.O.)
Just get on that plane. It's for your own good.

Gi-hun hangs up.
With his luggage, he turns around and walks away from the plane-- determined, with purpose --
towards somewhere unknown.

FADE OUT.


END EPISODE 09.
Genres: ["Thriller","Drama"]

Summary In the midst of the Squid Game, Sang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a brutal fight to the death. Sang-woo reveals his dark secret, leading to a heated argument. The fight escalates with both men using knives, resulting in bloody combat. Gi-hun gains the upper hand but is stabbed multiple times. However, Gi-hun retaliates by biting off Sang-woo's Achilles heel. As Sang-woo writhes in pain, Gi-hun confronts him about the deaths caused by the games. Gi-hun decides to end the game and approaches the Masked Soldier. The unexpected turn of events leaves everyone puzzled. Gi-hun returns home to find his mother dead, leading him to a downward spiral of homelessness and despair. A year later, he encounters a mysterious message that leads him to a private hospital room where he discovers Il-nam, the old man from the Squid Game. The scene explores themes of loss, redemption, and the consequences of participating in the deadly games.
Strengths
  • Intense action
  • Shocking revelations
  • Emotional impact
  • Compelling characters
Weaknesses
  • Some dialogue could be further developed

Ratings
Overall

Overall: 9

The scene is highly impactful and emotionally charged, with intense action and a shocking revelation. It leaves the audience with a sense of confusion and anticipation for what will happen next.


Story Content

Concept: 8

The concept of the Squid Game and the deadly games is intriguing and keeps the audience engaged. The revelation of Sang-woo's dark secret adds depth to the story and raises moral questions about the consequences of participating in the games.

Plot: 9

The plot of the scene is gripping and full of twists and turns. The intense fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun, the revelation of the dark secret, and Gi-hun's decision to end the game all contribute to the high rating.

Originality: 6

The level of originality in this scene is moderate. While the concept of a dangerous game is not entirely new, the specific details and the protagonist's motivations add freshness to the familiar premise. The authenticity of the characters' actions and dialogue contributes to the originality.


Character Development

Characters: 9

The characters of Sang-woo and Gi-hun are well-developed and their conflict adds depth to the scene. The emotional impact of their fight and the consequences of their actions make them compelling and relatable.

Character Changes: 9

Gi-hun undergoes a significant character change in the scene. He goes from being a participant in the deadly games to deciding to end the game and confront the organizers. This change is driven by his moral awakening and the realization of the consequences of his actions.

Internal Goal: 8

The protagonist's internal goal in this scene is to confront the Suited Man and find out more about the game and the organization behind it. This reflects his desire to seek justice and understand the reasons behind the atrocities committed in the game.

External Goal: 7

The protagonist's external goal in this scene is to catch up with the Suited Man and retrieve the business card. This reflects the immediate challenge of trying to uncover the truth and potentially save himself and others from the dangerous game.


Scene Elements

Conflict Level: 10

The conflict in the scene is intense and brutal, both physically and emotionally. The fight between Sang-woo and Gi-hun and their heated argument create a high level of conflict.

Opposition: 8

The opposition in this scene is strong, as the protagonist faces the Suited Man and the Man in a Jumper who try to stop him from retrieving the business card. The audience doesn't know how the confrontation will unfold, adding to the tension.

High Stakes: 10

The stakes in the scene are extremely high, with the characters fighting for their lives and facing the moral consequences of their actions. The discovery of Gi-hun's mother's death adds an additional layer of emotional stakes.

Story Forward: 9

The scene moves the story forward by revealing Sang-woo's dark secret, Gi-hun's decision to end the game, and the discovery of Il-nam in the private hospital room. It sets up new conflicts and plot developments.

Unpredictability: 8

This scene is unpredictable because it introduces a new character and a potential ally for the protagonist, as well as a new conflict with the Suited Man. The audience doesn't know how the confrontation will go and what consequences it might have.

Philosophical Conflict: 7

The philosophical conflict evident in this scene is the protagonist's belief in justice and his opposition to the organization running the game. This challenges his values and worldview, as he questions the morality of the game and seeks to expose the truth.


Audience Engagement

Emotional Impact: 10

The scene has a high emotional impact, with intense action, shocking revelations, and the tragic discovery of Gi-hun's mother's death. It evokes strong emotions from the audience.

Dialogue: 8

The dialogue in the scene is intense and emotionally charged. It effectively conveys the conflict between Sang-woo and Gi-hun and their moral dilemmas.

Engagement: 9

This scene is engaging because it introduces a new challenge for the protagonist, raises questions about the game and its organizers, and creates suspense through the protagonist's pursuit of the Suited Man.

Pacing: 9

The pacing of the scene contributes to its effectiveness by maintaining a fast pace and building tension. The short and direct dialogue exchanges, as well as the protagonist's actions, create a sense of urgency and keep the audience engaged.


Technical Aspect

Formatting: 9

The formatting of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It includes clear scene headings, character names in uppercase, and dialogue formatted correctly.

Structure: 8

The structure of this scene follows the expected format for its genre. It starts with a setup of the protagonist's internal and external goals, introduces a conflict, and ends with a cliffhanger that leads to the next episode.


Critique
  • The scene starts abruptly with Sang-woo's Mom discovering the stacks of cash in her luggage. It would be helpful to provide some context or build-up to this moment to create a stronger emotional impact.
  • The dialogue between Sang-woo's Mom and Gi-hun is minimal and lacks depth. It would be beneficial to explore their relationship and the significance of Sang-woo's borrowed money in more detail.
  • The transition from the subway platform to the airport lobby feels disjointed. It would be smoother to establish Gi-hun's arrival at the airport before introducing the Suited Man and the Man in a Jumper.
  • The confrontation between Gi-hun and the Man in a Jumper lacks tension and intensity. It would be more effective to heighten the stakes and increase the emotional conflict between them.
  • The scene ends abruptly with Gi-hun walking away from the plane. It would be more satisfying to provide a clearer sense of resolution or a cliffhanger that leaves the audience wanting more.
Suggestions
  • Consider adding a brief scene before Sang-woo's Mom discovers the cash, showing her emotional state and building anticipation for the reveal.
  • Expand the dialogue between Sang-woo's Mom and Gi-hun to delve deeper into their relationship and the impact of Sang-woo's borrowed money on their lives.
  • Smoothly transition from the subway platform to the airport lobby by establishing Gi-hun's arrival at the airport and his purpose for being there.
  • Intensify the confrontation between Gi-hun and the Man in a Jumper by adding more dialogue that reveals their conflicting motivations and emotions.
  • Provide a stronger ending by either offering a resolution to Gi-hun's pursuit of the game organizers or leaving the audience with a compelling cliffhanger that sets up the next episode.



Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:

Gi-hun

Gi-hun is a resourceful and quick-thinking man who is driven by a mix of nostalgia and determination. He values his friendships and is haunted by his past choices and the moral implications of the Squid Game. He is initially conflicted but becomes increasingly passionate and emotional as he confronts Sang-woo and makes difficult decisions to end the violence. He speaks with intensity, often reflecting on the past and expressing his inner turmoil.



Sang-woo

Sang-woo is a complex and focused character with a strong desire to win the game. He is cunning, resourceful, and willing to sacrifice others to ensure his own survival. He is haunted by his past actions and carries a heavy burden of guilt, resulting in an intense and confrontational speaking style that reflects his internal conflict.



CharacterArcCritiqueSuggestions
Gi-hun Gi-hun starts as a participant in the deadly games, driven by his financial struggles and desire to win the prize money. However, as he witnesses the deaths of others and confronts Sang-woo about his actions, he undergoes a moral awakening and becomes increasingly disillusioned with the games. His sense of justice and empathy drive him to make difficult decisions to end the violence, and he ultimately finds redemption by confronting his past and taking action to make a change. The character arc for Gi-hun is well-developed and emotionally impactful, but it may be difficult to fully explore in a single TV episode. Additionally, some of the character descriptions and speaking styles may overlap and become repetitive, which could potentially detract from the overall impact of the character. To improve the character arc, consider focusing on a few key moments or scenes that highlight Gi-hun's moral awakening and growth. Additionally, try to differentiate his speaking style and emotional state more clearly throughout the episode to avoid overlapping too much with previous descriptions.
Sang-woo Sang-woo's character arc revolves around his internal conflict between self-preservation and guilt. Initially, he is determined to do whatever it takes to win the game and survive. However, as the game progresses, he becomes increasingly haunted by his past actions, leading him to confront his inner turmoil. Ultimately, he sacrifices himself to save Gi-hun, demonstrating that he has become a more selfless and remorseful person. The character arc for Sang-woo is interesting, but it may not be feasible for a single tv_episode. The arc requires time to develop properly, including more flashbacks and emotional moments that explore Sang-woo's guilt and inner conflict. Without this development, his ultimate sacrifice may not feel earned or impactful. To improve the character arc for Sang-woo, consider expanding the runtime of the tv_episode or reducing the number of characters in the game. This would allow for more time to develop Sang-woo's backstory and inner turmoil. Additionally, incorporating more physical cues, such as facial expressions and body language, could help convey his emotional state to the audience in a shorter amount of time.
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:

Pattern Explanation
Tone and Emotional ImpactThere is a strong correlation between the tone of the scene and its emotional impact. Scenes with intense and emotional tones consistently score high in emotional impact.
Dialogue and Character ChangesScenes with strong dialogue tend to have more significant character changes. This suggests that dialogue is an effective tool for character development.
Conflict and High StakesScenes with high conflict tend to have high stakes. This makes sense, as high stakes often drive conflict.
Concept and PlotThere is a moderate correlation between the concept of the scene and its plot. Scenes with strong concepts tend to have more complex plots.
Characters and Emotional ImpactScenes with well-developed characters tend to have higher emotional impact. This suggests that readers are more invested in characters they care about.
Move Story Forward and Overall GradeScenes that effectively move the story forward tend to score higher overall grades. This suggests that readers value scenes that advance the plot.
Tone and ConflictScenes with intense tones tend to have high conflict. This makes sense, as intense tones often create tension and conflict.
Character Changes and Emotional ImpactScenes with significant character changes tend to have higher emotional impact. This suggests that readers are invested in character growth and development.
Dialogue and ConflictScenes with strong dialogue tend to have high conflict. This suggests that dialogue can be an effective tool for creating tension and conflict.
High Stakes and Emotional ImpactScenes with high stakes tend to have higher emotional impact. This makes sense, as readers are more invested in outcomes that have significant consequences.


Writer's Craft Overall Analysis

The writer demonstrates strong technical writing proficiency and an ability to create suspenseful and engaging scenes. However, there are areas for improvement in terms of character development, exploring different conflicts, and crafting emotionally resonant scenes.

Key Improvement Areas

Character development
While the scenes effectively establish the setting and challenges of the game, there is room for further development of the characters. This can be achieved by exploring their motivations, backstories, and internal conflicts.
Exploring different conflicts
The writer shows promise in creating tension and exploring moral dilemmas. However, it would be beneficial to practice creating conflicts with different philosophical viewpoints and motivations to add depth and complexity to the scenes.
Crafting emotionally resonant scenes
The scenes effectively convey tension and suspense, but there is an opportunity to further develop the emotional impact. This can be achieved by focusing on conveying emotions through actions, visuals, and minimal dialogue.

Suggestions

Type Suggestion Rationale
Book Save the Cat! Writes a Novel by Jessica Brody This book provides insights and exercises to improve the craft of screenwriting, including creating engaging scenes and developing unique voices.
Book Story by Robert McKee This book provides insights and techniques for crafting compelling and emotionally resonant scenes.
Exercise Write a scene with a different game and set of challengesPractice In SceneProv This exercise can help the writer explore different scenarios and develop their creativity in creating unique and engaging scenes.
Exercise Write a scene with a different philosophical conflictPractice In SceneProv This exercise can help the writer further develop their ability to create complex conflicts and explore different moral dilemmas.
Exercise Write a scene with minimal dialogue, focusing on conveying emotions through actions and visuals.Practice In SceneProv This exercise can help the writer further develop their ability to create engaging and impactful scenes.
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Story Explanation
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The Hunger Games Similarities: Both involve a game where participants must fight to the death. Both explore themes of survival, sacrifice, and rebellion against a corrupt system. Both have tense and suspenseful moments. Differences: The Hunger Games is set in a dystopian future, while Squid Game is set in the present day. The Hunger Games has a larger scale and political commentary, while Squid Game focuses more on personal stories and character development.
Oldboy Similarities: Both involve characters being trapped in a mysterious game with high stakes. Both explore themes of revenge, redemption, and the consequences of one's actions. Both have intense and violent moments. Differences: Oldboy has a more psychological and twisted narrative, while Squid Game has a more straightforward and grounded approach. Oldboy is more focused on the individual's journey, while Squid Game has a larger ensemble cast.
The Saw franchise Similarities: Both involve characters being trapped in deadly games where they must make difficult choices to survive. Both explore themes of morality, punishment, and the human capacity for cruelty. Both have tense and gruesome moments. Differences: The Saw franchise is more focused on horror and gore, while Squid Game has a more psychological and character-driven approach. The Saw franchise has multiple installments, while Squid Game is a standalone series.
The Running Man Similarities: Both involve a deadly game show where contestants must fight for their lives. Both explore themes of media manipulation, totalitarianism, and the power of resistance. Both have intense and action-packed moments. Differences: The Running Man is set in a dystopian future, while Squid Game is set in the present day. The Running Man has a more satirical tone, while Squid Game has a darker and more serious tone.
The Most Dangerous Game Similarities: Both involve a deadly game where human beings are hunted for sport. Both explore themes of survival, morality, and the thrill of the hunt. Both have tense and suspenseful moments. Differences: The Most Dangerous Game is a short story, while Squid Game is a TV series. The Most Dangerous Game has a more classic and timeless feel, while Squid Game has a contemporary and socially relevant approach.
The Maze Runner Similarities: Both involve a group of people trapped in a deadly game with mysterious rules and challenges. Both explore themes of survival, friendship, and the search for answers. Both have tense and action-packed moments. Differences: The Maze Runner is set in a post-apocalyptic world, while Squid Game is set in the present day. The Maze Runner has a more sci-fi and adventure-oriented plot, while Squid Game has a more grounded and character-driven narrative.
No Escape Similarities: Both involve characters trapped in a foreign country where they must fight for their lives. Both explore themes of survival, family, and the chaos of war. Both have intense and action-packed moments. Differences: No Escape is set in a war-torn country, while Squid Game is set in South Korea. No Escape has a more realistic and gritty tone, while Squid Game has a more stylized and visually striking approach.
The Belko Experiment Similarities: Both involve a group of people trapped in a deadly game where they must kill each other to survive. Both explore themes of human nature, morality, and the thin line between civilization and chaos. Both have tense and violent moments. Differences: The Belko Experiment is set in a corporate office building, while Squid Game is set in various locations. The Belko Experiment has a more satirical and darkly comedic tone, while Squid Game has a more serious and dramatic tone.
Cube Similarities: Both involve a group of people trapped in a deadly maze-like structure where they must solve puzzles to survive. Both explore themes of trust, paranoia, and the nature of reality. Both have tense and suspenseful moments. Differences: Cube has a more sci-fi and surreal atmosphere, while Squid Game has a more grounded and realistic setting. Cube focuses more on the puzzle-solving aspect, while Squid Game focuses more on the psychological and emotional journey of the characters.

Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay

Trope Trope Details Trope Explanation
Final Game ShowdownSang-woo and Gi-hun engage in a bloody knife fight in the final game.The Final Game Showdown trope is a common trope in which the main characters face off in a climactic battle or confrontation. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Hunger Games' when Katniss and Peeta fight against the other tributes in the final game.
FlashbackA scene takes place in a playground during a flashback where Sang-woo and Gi-hun reminisce about their childhood.The Flashback trope is used to provide background information or context by showing events that happened in the past. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Lost' where flashbacks are used to reveal the characters' backstories.
Tragic DeathSang-woo unexpectedly stabs himself and dies in Gi-hun's arms.The Tragic Death trope is used to create a dramatic and emotional moment in a story. It often involves the sudden and unexpected death of a character. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'Romeo + Juliet' where Romeo and Juliet both die tragically at the end of the story.
Emotional TurmoilGi-hun experiences emotional turmoil over his mother's death and his uncertain future.The Emotional Turmoil trope is used to depict a character's inner struggles and conflicts. It often involves intense emotions such as grief, sadness, or confusion. An example of this trope can be seen in the TV show 'Breaking Bad' where the main character, Walter White, experiences emotional turmoil as he becomes involved in the drug trade.
Philosophical ConversationIl-nam and Gi-hun discuss the purpose of the game and their differing views on the value of human life.The Philosophical Conversation trope is used to explore deeper themes and ideas through dialogue between characters. It often involves discussions about morality, ethics, or the meaning of life. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Matrix' where the characters engage in philosophical conversations about the nature of reality.
Life and Death ReflectionIl-nam dies as the clock strikes midnight, and Gi-hun reflects on their time together.
Confronting the VillainGi-hun walks away from the plane, determined to confront the people behind the game.The Confronting the Villain trope is used to create a climactic moment where the protagonist confronts the main antagonist or the source of conflict. It often involves a final showdown or confrontation. An example of this trope can be seen in the movie 'The Dark Knight' where Batman confronts the Joker in a final battle.


Theme Theme Details Themee Explanation
Betrayal and DeceptionThe theme of betrayal and deception is present throughout the screenplay, particularly in the scenes involving Sang-woo and Gi-hun. Sang-woo's attempt to attack Gi-hun with a knife during the Squid Game and their subsequent knife fight demonstrate the betrayal between friends. Additionally, the revelation that the games were orchestrated by the VIPs and the Masked Soldiers shows the deception and betrayal of the participants.This theme explores the idea of trust and loyalty being broken, leading to conflict and emotional turmoil for the characters.
Survival and DesperationThe theme of survival and desperation is evident in various scenes, such as the Squid Game and the bet proposed by Il-nam. The characters are driven to extreme measures in order to survive, whether it's participating in deadly games or making life-or-death decisions. The emotional tone of these scenes is intense and violent, highlighting the desperation of the characters.This theme explores the lengths people are willing to go to in order to survive, as well as the moral dilemmas they face in such situations.
Friendship and LoyaltyThe theme of friendship and loyalty is explored in the scenes involving Sang-woo and Gi-hun, particularly in the flashback scene and the final scene. Despite the conflicts and betrayals, there is still a deep bond between the two characters. Sang-woo's apology and Gi-hun's emotional reaction in the flashback scene demonstrate their friendship, while Gi-hun's decision to confront the people behind the game in the final scene shows his loyalty to Sang-woo.This theme explores the power of friendship and the sacrifices people are willing to make for those they care about.
Guilt and RedemptionThe theme of guilt and redemption is present in the scenes involving Gi-hun, particularly in the flashback scene and the scene with Sang-woo's Mom. Gi-hun carries a sense of guilt for his past actions and the choices he made, which is evident in his emotional reaction to Sang-woo's apology and his willingness to help Sang-woo's Mom. The emotional tone of these scenes is tragic and heartbreaking, highlighting Gi-hun's desire for redemption.This theme explores the idea of seeking redemption for past mistakes and the emotional toll it takes on individuals.
Power and ControlThe theme of power and control is evident in the scenes involving the VIPs, the Masked Soldiers, and Il-nam. The VIPs and Masked Soldiers hold power and control over the participants in the games, manipulating and orchestrating their actions. Il-nam's creation of the game and his philosophy on money and life also reflect the theme of power and control.This theme explores the dynamics of power and control, as well as the consequences of individuals wielding such power.



Screenwriting Resources on Themes

Articles

Site Description
Studio Binder Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters
Coverfly Improving your Screenplay's theme
John August Writing from Theme

YouTube Videos

Title Description
Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics Screenwriting basics - beginner video
What is theme Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay.
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts
Voice Analysis
Summary: The writer's voice is characterized by concise and impactful dialogue, minimalistic description, and a focus on tension, suspense, and moral dilemmas. The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of urgency, exploring deeper themes, and developing complex characters through dialogue and action.
Voice Contribution The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a tense and suspenseful atmosphere, exploring moral dilemmas and philosophical themes, and developing complex characters through concise and impactful dialogue. The writer's voice also adds depth to the screenplay by effectively conveying emotions and actions without relying heavily on dialogue or description.
Best Representation Scene 6 - The Final Showdown
Best Scene Explanation This scene is the best representation because it showcases their ability to create tension and mystery through concise dialogue and descriptive narrative.
Originality
  • Overall originality score: 7
  • Overall originality explanation: The screenplay demonstrates a moderate to high level of originality. While some concepts and tropes are familiar, the specific details, fresh approaches, and authentic character actions and dialogue contribute to the overall originality of the screenplay.
  • Most unique situations: The most unique situations in the screenplay are the deadly game of Squid Game with its specific rules and challenges, the depiction of a character taking their own life as a result of the game, and the exploration of moral dilemmas faced by the characters.
  • Overall unpredictability score: 8
  • Overall unpredictability explanation: The full screenplay is fairly unpredictable, with unexpected twists and turns throughout. The audience is kept on their toes as they navigate the deadly game and the characters' choices and motivations. The screenplay successfully maintains a sense of suspense and keeps the audience guessing.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict
internal GoalsThe protagonist's internal goals evolve throughout the script, reflecting their deeper needs and fears.
External Goals The protagonist's external goals also evolve, reflecting the immediate challenges they face in the game and in their personal lives.
Philosophical Conflict The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around the protagonist's beliefs and values being challenged by the violent and morally ambiguous nature of the Squid Game.


Character Development Contribution: The evolving internal and external goals contribute to the protagonist's development by challenging their beliefs, values, and motivations. They are forced to confront their fears, seek forgiveness, question their own morality, and strive for justice and understanding.

Narrative Structure Contribution: The evolving goals provide a clear throughline for the protagonist's journey, driving the narrative forward and creating tension and conflict. They also serve as catalysts for plot developments and character interactions.

Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and philosophical conflict deepen the thematic exploration of survival, justice, forgiveness, love, and the nature of humanity. They raise questions about morality, the value of life, and the consequences of one's actions.


Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Articles

Site Description
Creative Screenwriting How Important Is A Character’s Goal?
Studio Binder What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict

YouTube Videos

Title Description
How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode.
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy?
World Building
  • Physical environment: The world depicted in the screenplay is a mix of different physical environments, including a game arena, a semi-basement apartment, a subway car, a snowy street, a private hospital room, an airport, and various other locations. Each environment has its own unique characteristics that contribute to the overall atmosphere and tone of the scenes.
  • Culture: The cultural element present in the screenplay is the Squid Game itself, which was originally a children's game played in Korea. The game has been transformed into a deadly competition with high stakes and life-or-death challenges. The cultural significance of the game adds depth to the narrative and explores themes of childhood innocence, societal pressures, and the dark side of human nature.
  • Society: The societal structure in the screenplay is depicted through various characters and their interactions. There are VIPs who watch the Squid Game, a hidden organization orchestrating the game, and ordinary people struggling to survive in a harsh and unforgiving world. The societal structure highlights the power dynamics, inequality, and exploitation present in the world of the screenplay.
  • Technology: The technological aspects in the screenplay include the use of walkie-talkies, cell phones, an ATM machine, and a coin toss. These technological elements serve as tools for communication, decision-making, and survival. They also reflect the modern world and the role of technology in shaping human experiences and actions.
  • Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology shape the characters' experiences and actions in the screenplay. The physical environments create a sense of atmosphere, tension, and isolation, which influence the characters' emotions and behaviors. The cultural element of the Squid Game affects the characters' motivations, as they are driven by the desire to win and survive. The societal structure and power dynamics shape the characters' relationships and choices. The technological elements provide opportunities for communication, decision-making, and manipulation.
  • Narrative contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the narrative by creating a rich and immersive world for the characters to navigate. The physical environments, cultural elements, societal structure, and technology provide the backdrop for the characters' journeys, conflicts, and transformations. They also drive the plot forward, as the characters are forced to confront the challenges and dangers of their world. The world elements add depth and complexity to the narrative, allowing for exploration of themes such as survival, morality, identity, and the human condition.
  • Thematic depth contribution: The world elements in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth by exploring various themes and ideas. The physical environments reflect the characters' internal states and external circumstances, highlighting themes of isolation, despair, and hope. The cultural element of the Squid Game raises questions about the nature of competition, the loss of innocence, and the consequences of societal pressures. The societal structure exposes the inequalities and power dynamics that exist in the world, touching on themes of class, exploitation, and corruption. The technological elements raise questions about the role of technology in shaping human experiences and actions, and the ethical implications of its use. Overall, the world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by providing a rich and thought-provoking exploration of human nature, society, and the complexities of the human condition.

Screenplay Rating:

Consider

Executive Summary

Squid Game Episode 9 delivers a compelling and suspenseful conclusion to the main game, with strong character development, high-stakes action, and thought-provoking social commentary. While there are opportunities to improve pacing, explore supporting characters further, and provide more background information about the game's organizers, the episode effectively sets the stage for potential future storylines and leaves the audience eager to learn more.

Strengths
  • Strong character development, particularly for Gi-hun and Sang-woo, whose complex relationship drives the narrative and explores themes of morality and survival. high
  • High-stakes conflict and suspenseful action sequences, especially during the Squid Game itself, keep the audience engaged and on the edge of their seats. high ( Scene 3  Scene 5  Scene 7  Scene 9  )
  • Intriguing world-building and social commentary through the presence of the VIPs and their detached observation of the game, raising questions about wealth, power, and entertainment. medium ( Scene 2  Scene 4  Scene 8  Scene 10  Scene 12  Scene 14  Scene 18  )
  • Effective use of emotional moments, such as Gi-hun's discovery of his mother's death and his encounter with the flower seller, to add depth and pathos to the story. medium ( Scene 24  Scene 27  )
  • The ending leaves the audience with a sense of ambiguity and anticipation for future developments, as Gi-hun chooses to confront the game organizers rather than move on with his life. medium ( Scene 34  Scene 36  )
Areas of Improvement
  • The pacing could be tightened in certain sections, especially during dialogue-heavy scenes that don't directly advance the plot. medium
  • The motivations and backstories of the VIPs remain largely unexplored, leaving their role in the narrative somewhat underdeveloped. medium ( Scene 2  Scene 4  Scene 8  Scene 10  Scene 12  Scene 14  Scene 18  )
  • The year-long gap between the game and Gi-hun's reunion with Il-nam feels a bit abrupt and could benefit from additional scenes showing his struggles and attempts to cope with his trauma. low ( Scene 25  Scene 26  Scene 27  Scene 28  Scene 29  )
MissingElements
  • Further exploration of the origins and purpose of the Squid Game organization would provide more context and depth to the overall narrative. high
  • The fate of Sae-byeok's brother and his relationship with Sang-woo's mother could be explored in more detail to provide closure to their storylines. medium ( Scene 32  Scene 33  )
NotablePoints
  • The flashback scene with Il-nam and the Front Man adds a layer of complexity to their characters and hints at a deeper connection between them. medium ( Scene 30  )
  • Gi-hun's red hair dye symbolizes a significant change in his personality and outlook on life, suggesting a newfound determination and perhaps a hint of rebellion. low ( Scene 31  )
Memorable lines in the script:

Scene Number Line
2Gi-hun: You killed them. You’re the one who killed them!
3Sang-woo: Gi-hun. I’m sorry.
6Il-nam: You asked me why I let you live. Because it was fun playing with you.
5Il-nam: If you play the game, I'll answer your questions.
7Gi-hun: That's why I can't forgive you for everything you're doing.