Being John Malkovich

A surreal satire about authorship and desire: a small-time puppeteer discovers how intoxicating it is to live inside another's life, and soon the world will kneel before whoever controls the head of a celebrity.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

Being John Malkovich offers a unique and captivating premise that sets it apart from other films in the genre. The script's exploration of identity, individuality, and the consequences of our desires is both intellectually stimulating and emotionally engaging. The script's blend of surreal, darkly comedic, and philosophical elements creates a distinctive and compelling viewing experience that would appeal to a wide range of audiences, from fans of quirky, high-concept stories to those interested in more complex, character-driven narratives.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Grok
 Highly Recommend
Gemini
 Highly Recommend
DeepSeek
 Highly Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 9.2
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script's singular, brilliant premise is its greatest asset — keep the surreal set pieces and the puppetry metaphors intact. To make the film leaner and emotionally satisfying, tighten the long middle by pruning repetitive ‘customer/cult’ beats (many of the ditch exits, orientation films and queued clients can be consolidated) and clarify a few operational rules of the portal early (timing, ejection mechanics, cumulative possession). Also deepen Craig's inner turning point so his moral slide (kidnapping, sexual control, final fate) reads as an earned arc rather than a sequence of escalating incidents. Finally, revisit a few dated/edgy comic beats (cross‑dressing, casual slurs) to preserve dark humor without alienating modern audiences.
For Executives:
This is high‑concept, auteur‑level material with clear festival and awards potential and a built‑in marketing hook (the literal portal into a celebrity's head). It’s commercially risky but uniquely marketable: strong auteur/director attachment and a marquee actor (Malkovich) could make it a prestige hit. Key production risks are mid‑act pacing that may lose mainstream viewers, the cost/complexity of signature set pieces (membranous tunnel, 7½ floor, giant marionettes), and sensitivity/legal issues around portrayal of real persons and dated comedic beats — addressable but real. With a director who can balance surreal spectacle and intimate stakes, modest trimming and sensitivity notes, this is a viable, distinct property worth developing.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 45% Fantasy 35% Comedy 30% Romance 25% Thriller 20%

Setting: Contemporary, Various locations in New York City, including a surreal gray-painted Manhattan, a theater, and a hidden green oasis.

Themes: Identity and Self-Transformation, Escapism and the Desire for Power/Fulfillment, Illusion of Control and Manipulation, Consequences of Unchecked Ambition and Desire, The Nature of Performance and Art, Loneliness and the Search for Connection, The Absurdity of Existence, The Nature of Reality vs. Illusion

Conflict & Stakes: The central conflict revolves around Craig's obsession with controlling John Malkovich's mind, leading to emotional turmoil in his marriage with Lotte and the ethical implications of identity and autonomy.

Mood: Surreal and darkly comedic, with moments of introspection and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of a portal into the mind of a famous actor, allowing exploration of identity and consciousness.
  • Major Twist: The revelation that Craig is a marionette controlled by Mantini, highlighting themes of control and manipulation.
  • Distinctive Setting: The surreal gray-painted Manhattan contrasted with vibrant hidden oases, emphasizing themes of oppression and liberation.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of puppetry as a metaphor for control and identity, blending performance art with psychological exploration.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast with complex motivations, including a puppeteer, a famous actor, and a supportive monkey.

Comparable Scripts: Being John Malkovich, Adaptation, The Metamorphosis by Franz Kafka, The Hours, Synecdoche, New York, The Puppetmaster, Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, The Science of Sleep, The Master

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 7.7
Typical rewrite gain: +0.35 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Gets you ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,846 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Emotional Impact (Script Level) is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.35 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Dialogue
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Dialogue score: 8.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Dialogue
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,902 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Dialogue by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Concept
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Concept score: 8.5
Typical rewrite gain: +0.25 in Concept
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~2,164 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Concept by about +0.25 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.03
Key Suggestions:
The script's core is wildly original and emotionally rich, but it needs sharper stakes and clearer motivations to land with audiences. Prioritize deepening the emotional conflict between Craig and Lotte (longer, quieter beats; clearer consequences), and tighten/clarify the portal by showing its mechanics and costs through active, visual beats rather than exposition. Also strengthen secondary players (Lester, Floris, Maxine) with one concrete backstory beat each so their actions feel inevitable rather than whimsical. Trim or combine mid‑section scenes that stall momentum and reallocate that time to high‑impact confrontations and the film’s philosophical payoffs.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Your concept is brilliant and distinctive — a surreal, philosophical ride that probes identity and desire — but the execution drifts. Tighten the spine: choose a clearer through-line (Craig’s failed selfhood vs. the portal’s ethical threat) and prune detours that don’t develop that conflict. Compress or merge scenes that repeat the same beat (disguises, jobs, jail, repeated ‘I’m a puppeteer’ moments) and deepen key emotional beats (Craig/Lotte fracture and Lotte’s transformation) so the surreal imagery always advances character choices and consequences.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong (distinct, large personalities) but the script needs a clearer emotional throughline: tighten Craig’s moral and psychological logic so each escalation (portal exploitation, violence, puppet/control obsession) feels inevitable and earned. Clarify Lotte’s internal turning points so her shift from supportive wife to revolutionary actor reads as agency rather than plot reaction. Make Maxine and Malkovich’s motivations slightly more legible (why she tolerates Craig, why he resists) so the thematic questions about identity vs. control land emotionally. Small rewrites that sharpen key beats — one early scene showing the origin of Craig’s need for validation, one intimate scene that decisively changes Lotte — will give the large, surreal plot an emotional spine.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows the script’s greatest asset is its daring tonal range and concept, but its emotional arc needs surgical tuning. Most urgently: preserve a thread of empathy for Craig as he descends—add one or two intimate, private beats where he reacts with fear, shame or conflicted remorse after first controlling Malkovich. Also smooth the intensity curve by adding short moments of genuine warmth (extend the reconciliation beat with Lotte, give Elijah an early empathic moment) and by slowing the reveal of key betrayals so the audience can feel the loss, not just see it. Minor structural edits—one quiet scene after a violent high, a micro-moment of joy before a fall, a hesitation before moral compromises—will make the metaphysical spectacle land emotionally.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis pins the script’s emotional engine on Craig’s struggle between identity and control. To strengthen the script, sharpen Craig’s throughline: make his internal need (to be seen/validated as an artist and as a man) drive every major choice and clarify the consequences of his attempts to control others (especially via Malkovich). Tighten and streamline subplots (the cult, Lester, Flemmer, the business schemes) so they amplify one central philosophical question rather than competing with it. Also give Lotte and Maxine clearer, active arcs that meaningfully challenge Craig — this will heighten stakes and make the philosophical reveal feel earned instead of portentous. Finally, choose a tonal register (dark fable vs black comedy vs surreal drama) and lean into it to keep audience sympathy and pacing consistent through the film’s many weird turns.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
This is a wildly imaginative, high‑concept script with a powerful central obsession: identity and the itch to become someone else. To lift it from fascinating to emotionally memorable, anchor the surreal spectacle in a clearer emotional throughline. Focus the screenplay on Craig’s interior stakes (what he will lose if he fails, what he must learn if he survives), tighten or combine episodic detours that dilute momentum, and make Lotte and Maxine fully agentive so their choices carry weight rather than feel like plot mechanisms. Keep the surrealism — but make cause-and-effect and emotional payoffs unmistakable so audiencese feel the cost of each transformation and the final twist lands as earned rather than arbitrary.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s central high-concept — a literal portal into John Malkovich’s mind — is compelling but currently undercut by unclear mechanics and uneven character motivation. First, explicitly define the portal’s rules early (who can enter, duration, sensory limits, ejection behavior, whether possession stacks or can be controlled). Use show-don’t-tell experiments and consistent cause-and-effect so later scenes (possession, mass-occupation, legal threats) feel earned. Second, tighten character arcs: give Craig believable escalation (why he moves from desperate artist to coercive aggressor) and deepen Lotte’s inner reasons for returning to the portal so their choices feel motivated, not arbitrary. Fixing the portal rules will also let you layer character stakes more clearly and keep the surreal parts emotionally resonant rather than confusing.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — a sharp, deadpan mix of surreal absurdity and heartfelt melancholy — is the script's greatest asset. Lean into that singular tone, but tighten the emotional throughline: ensure each surreal vignette and comic set-piece serves a clear turn in Craig's inner journey. Trim episodic detours that repeat the same thematic beat (disguises, auditions, portal-commercializing) and lean scenes toward showing rather than explaining. Strengthen character-specific registers (so Maxine, Lotte, Lester, Craig all sound distinct), and let quieter moments breathe so the script's philosophical punches land emotionally rather than only intellectually.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay is wildly imaginative and tonally adventurous, but its emotional impact will strengthen most by sharpening the subtext in dialogue and clarifying character motivations. Prioritize rewrites that give each scene a clear objective for the POV character, use quieter beats to let surreal set-pieces land, and rewrite lines so conversations reveal desire and threat indirectly rather than via explanation. Tighten pacing by trimming or compressing episodic detours that don’t advance character stakes, and anchor the surreal with intimate, specific character choices so the audience can care amid the oddness.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world is rich, bold and distinct — a pitch-perfect mix of dark comedy, surreal fantasy and human drama — but its emotional impact suffers when the central fantastic device (the Malkovich portal) and the story’s rules feel inconsistent or serve spectacle over consequence. Tighten and codify the portal’s mechanics, clarify cause-and-effect, and anchor surreal set pieces to clear emotional stakes for Craig, Lotte and Maxine. Do that and the script’s invention will feel meaningful rather than arbitrary: each weird moment will advance character and theme rather than just amaze.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script’s strongest asset is its high-concept surrealism—those scenes score highly for originality and imaginative world-building. But that strength also exposes a vulnerability: tonal shifts (humor, melancholy, surreal) sometimes diffuse dramatic urgency and can leave audiences unsure what to care about. Tighten the emotional through-line (pick one or two relationship anchors—Craig/Lotte and Craig’s puppeteer identity—and let them carry the stakes), keep the surreal imagery but clarify cause/effect so consequences feel earned, and lean into your clear gift for sarcastic dialogue to make character choices resonate amid the weirdness.
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