Mr Robot
Executive Summary
Overview
Genres: Drama, Thriller, Mystery
Setting: Present day, New York City
Overview: Mr. Robot follows paranoid computer programmer Elliot Alderson, who is recruited by an enigmatic anarchist known as Mr. Robot to join a group of underground hackers called fsociety. Elliot struggles with mental health issues as he tries to balance his personal life with his involvement in a dangerous conspiracy to take down the corrupt conglomerate E Corp. As the season progresses, Elliot uncovers a vast network of deceit that stretches from the boardroom of E Corp to the deepest recesses of his own mind.
Themes: Alienation and Loneliness, Identity and Reality, Technology and Power, Revolution and Rebellion, Mental Illness, Love and Loss
Conflict and Stakes: Elliot's struggle with mental illness and his mission to take down E Corp, a corrupt multinational corporation that controls the world economy.
Overall Mood: Dark and suspenseful, with moments of humor and social commentary
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: Elliot's paranoia and hallucinations are introduced.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The protagonist is a mentally ill hacker who hallucinates his deceased father as a revolutionary figure.
- Plot Twist: The protagonist's therapist is revealed to be a member of the anarchist group he has joined.
- Distinctive Setting: The story is set in the world of technology and cybercrime.
- Innovative Idea: The story explores the dangers of technology and the power of individuals to make a difference.
- Unique Character: The protagonist is a complex and relatable character who struggles with mental illness and social alienation.
- Genre Blend: The story blends elements of psychological thrillers, technology-themed dramas, and social commentaries.
Comparable Scripts:
- Mr. Robot
- Fight Club
- The Social Network
- Silicon Valley
- The Matrix
- Blade Runner
- The Catcher in the Rye
- 1984
- The Book Thief
- The Fault in Our Stars
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a blend of psychological depth, suspenseful storytelling, and exploration of complex moral dilemmas. It often delves into dark and introspective themes, capturing the internal struggles and external conflicts of its characters. The writing style is characterized by sharp dialogue, intense character dynamics, and an atmospheric setting that immerses the audience in the narrative's emotional depth.
Style Similarities:
- Christopher Nolan
- David Fincher
- Sam Esmail
Pass/Consider/Recommend
Recommend
Explanation: The screenplay of 'Mr. Robot' is a compelling narrative that effectively combines elements of psychological drama and thriller with a strong focus on cybersecurity. The character development, particularly of Elliot, is well-executed, with a deep dive into his psychological state. The plot is engaging with several twists that maintain suspense. However, improvements could be made in pacing and clarity of some technical aspects.
USP: This techno-thriller script offers a unique blend of gripping intrigue and innovative storytelling that sets it apart from other works in the genre. The protagonist, Elliot, is a deeply troubled cybersecurity engineer struggling with insomnia, paranoia, and a strong sense of justice. As the story progresses, Elliot delves deeper into a world of cyber attacks, corporate corruption, and a mysterious hacker group known as fsociety. The script's distinct elements include: - **A complex and troubled protagonist**: Elliot is a morally conflicted character who faces inner demons while navigating a web of deception and danger. - **Themes of power, control, and societal manipulation**: The script explores how power dynamics and corporate corruption shape the world and the lives of individuals. - **Innovative storytelling techniques**: The use of voiceover narration, flashbacks, and surreal imagery creates a layered and immersive storytelling experience. - **A blend of genres and influences**: The script draws from elements of psychological thrillers, cybercrime dramas, and conspiracy theories, offering a fresh and captivating perspective on the human condition in the digital age. This unique combination of elements creates a compelling and thought-provoking narrative that will leave viewers on the edge of their seats, eager to discover the truth behind the shadowy world of hacking and corporate control.
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$40-50 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-35, fans of psychological thrillers and technology-themed dramas
Marketability: It has a unique and timely premise, a well-developed and relatable protagonist, and a talented cast.
unique blend of genres and explores compelling themes with a diverse cast...
Compelling characters and a gripping storyline, relevant social themes...
Profit Potential: High, due to its strong appeal to a wide adult audience and potential for award nominations
Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of introspective voiceover narration, dark and mysterious atmosphere, and a focus on themes of technology, power, and conspiracy.
Best representation: Scene 1 - Elliot Confronts Phil. This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it establishes the tone, themes, and character of the series.
Memorable Lines:
- Elliot: It's happening. It's happening. It's happening. It's happening. (Scene 16)
- Elliot: Fuck society. (Scene 5)
- Elliot: The key to doing morphine without turning into a junkie is to limit yourself to 30mg a day. (Scene 7)
- Mr. Robot: My dad was a petty thief. Never could hold down a job. So, he just robbed, convenience stores, shops, small-time stuff. (Scene 10)
- Elliot: Sometimes I dream of saving everyone from the invisible hand. (Scene 6)
Characters
Elliot Alderson:A socially awkward and paranoid computer hacker who joins a group of anarchists to take down an evil corporation.
Angela Moss:A software engineer who is struggling with student loan debt and a troubled relationship.
Darlene Alderson:Elliot's sister, a heroin addict and prostitute.
Edward Alderson:Elliot's deceased father, a psychiatrist who was killed by E Corp.
Mr. Robot:A mysterious figure who appears to Elliot as a hallucination of his father.
Story Shape
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall Grade | Concept | Plot | Originality Score | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Elliot's Paranoid Awakening | Dark, Introspective, Paranoid | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - Elliot Confronts Phil | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
3 - Subway Paranoia and Workplace Tensions | Suspenseful, Intense, Serious, Tense | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Birthday and Cybersecurity Concerns | Paranoia, Suspense, Tension, Anxiety | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Elliot's Therapy Session | Suspenseful, Introspective, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Unwelcome Reconciliation | Anxious, Paranoid, Reflective | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Elliot's Descent and Michael's True Colors | Loneliness, Drug use, Paranoia, Emotional turmoil | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - The DoS Attack | Tense, Suspenseful, Serious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
9 - Network Meltdown | Tense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
10 - Uneasy Alliance | Tense, Mysterious, Intense, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Introducing Fsociety | Suspenseful, Intense, Mysterious, Reflective | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Confusion and Tension at the Arcade | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - The Ferris Wheel Confrontation | Intense, Conspiratorial, Emotional, Philosophical | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Elliot's Plan for Angela's Debt | Anxiety, Tension, Suspense, Disappointment, Dread | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Elliot's Manipulative Confrontation | Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Unresolved Confrontation and Mysterious Arrest | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 |
Scene 1 - Elliot's Paranoid Awakening
Pilot
Written by
Sam Esmail
Polish
May 27, 2014
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“Our democracy has been hacked. The operating system has been
taken over and turned to uses that are somewhat different than
the ones our founders intended to emerge.” - Al Gore, 2013
“Give a man a gun, and he can rob a bank. Give a man a bank,
and he can rob the world.” - Internet Meme, c. 2011
2.
BLACK.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Hello friend. Hello friend? That’s
lame. Maybe I should give you a name? *
But that’s a slippery slope. You’re
only in my head. We have to remember
that.
(then) *
Shit. It’s actually happened. I’m *
talking to an imaginary person. *
Loud, violent jazz RISES on the soundtrack. Within the black
of frame, silhouettes begin forming.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I sometimes think dinosaurs never
existed. For absolutely no scientific
reason do I think this. I have
chronic insomnia. I think aliens are
real. I think they’re invisible and
staring straight at us. I also
believe there’s a shadowy group of
rich people who secretly run the *
world.
We pull out to reveal we’re in an office looking out of a very
tall Manhattan skyscraper. Shadowy figures sit and stand
around a conference table, arguing.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I’m talking about the ten or fifteen
zillionaires that we don’t know
about. The guys who control the guys
that control. The guys that play God
without permission.
CUT TO BLACK.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
And now I think they’re following me.
INT. NYC SUBWAY (MOVING) - MORNING
We finally meet ELLIOT (late 20s). His hoodie throws a sliced
shadow over his face. *
He sneaks looks at a couple of mysterious MEN DRESSED IN
BLACK, one on either side of the train. One reads the NY Post.
The other looks straight ahead, suspiciously so.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
This is about last night. I should
have gone to Angela’s birthday party--
3.
Ratings
Scene 2 - Elliot Confronts Phil
A small coffee shop with a few patrons. A cheesy sign that *
reads “Phil’s Coffee” displays proudly above. Elliot sits by *
himself, hoodie on, no coffee. His leg taps nervously.
Elliot intently watches as a mild-mannered Indian with a *
mustache walks into the shop. This is PHIL (50s). *
He orders a latte from the front and sits alone. He pulls out *
his iPad and sips his latte, enjoying the quiet evening to *
himself. *
Elliot musters courage with a deep breath and walks over. He *
sits across from him without saying a word, his leg twitching. *
Finally, Phil looks up. *
ELLIOT *
You’re Phil. *
He nervously gestures to the cheesy sign. Confused, Phil just *
offers a quick smile in return-- *
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
But your real name is Rohit Pathak. *
(nervous and robotic) *
You changed it to Phil when you *
bought your first Phil’s Coffee shop *
six years ago. Now you have seventeen *
of them with eight more coming next *
quarter. You married an American *
woman named Linda Fielding, age *
thirty-one, then had two kids with *
her. Smallbiztrends.com said your *
life was so perfect it felt like “the *
stuff of sitcoms.” *
An awkward silence. Phil licks his lips, not sure if he should *
be flattered or concerned. *
PHIL *
(thick Indian accent) *
May I help you with something? *
ELLIOT *
I liked coming here because the WIFI *
was fast and with no dropouts. It was *
good. So good that it scratched that *
part of my mind-- the part that *
doesn’t allow good to exist without *
condition. So, I snooped on the *
traffic and that’s when I noticed *
something strange in the filenames-- *
4.
Elliot looks down, nervous to go on. But he looks back up with *
confidence. *
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
That’s when I decided to hack you. *
Another awkward silence. Phil goes to say something-- *
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
I know you run a website called *
Lolita City. *
Alarms suddenly go off in Phil’s world. *
PHIL *
Pardon me? *
ELLIOT
You use the company servers to run it
through Tor networking,
SUPER: “Tor Networking - a system intended to enable online
anonymity”
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Routing the traffic from shop to
shop, making it virtually
untraceable. You made it really hard
for anyone to see it.
Even though Elliot came off a little amateurish at first, his *
confidence builds as he continues to talk. *
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
But I saw it. With all the public *
info out there on you; birth dates, *
anniversary dates, family names, *
pets... *
(clears his throat) *
I cracked your password in three *
minutes. *
Angry and confused, Phil eyes Elliot carefully. *
PHIL
Sir...What is the meaning of this?
ELLIOT
(back to nervous)
Sorry, I’m a little nervous. It’s my
first time doing this in person.
PHIL
(firm)
Sir, I must ask you to kindly leave--
5.
Phil turns to the man working the register--
ELLIOT
I downloaded everything. All your
emails, all your files, all
your...pics.
Phil turns back around. This just got serious, and it shows.
PHIL
(angry)
Get out of here right now, sir, or I
will call the--
ELLIOT
FBI? Do you want them to find out
about the 100GB of child pornography
you serve to your 400,000 users?
That’s a lot of bandwidth, of course,
which explains the higher than usual
speeds on all your shops’ internet
connections.
Phil is stunned silent. For a moment, all that can be heard is
the soft musak and quiet sipping of coffee from the other
patrons. Phil looks down, cornered and speechless. Elliot
looks genuinely sympathetic.
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
Personally, I was hoping it was just *
going to be BDSM stuff. Do you *
realize how much simpler that would *
have been? *
PHIL
So, you are not with the police?
(off his head shake)
Then this is illegal. This is
forbidden, sir. I did not hurt
anyone, I never did-- that is my
business, my personal life!
All the blood in Phil’s face as drained. He wipes his eyes as
emotion begins to fill his face. Elliot looks at him, a mix of
pity and guilt.
ELLIOT *
I understand what it’s like to be *
different. I’m very different too. I *
mean, I don’t jerk off to little *
kids, but...I don’t know how to talk *
people. My dad was the only one I *
could talk to. But he died. *
6.
At first, Phil is unsure on how to proceed. But sensing an
opportunity, he takes a deep breath and nods sympathetically.
PHIL
I’m sorry to hear that. How did he
pass, if I may ask?
ELLIOT
Leukemia. Definitely got it from the
radiation at the company he worked
at, though we couldn’t prove it. Now
he’s dead. The company’s fine though.
PHIL
My father passed when I was young
too. I was close to him, exactly like
you...
His mind clearly elsewhere, he can’t help but start crying.
Elliot genuinely feels for him.
ELLIOT
Can I call you Rohit? I prefer your
real name. Phil is kinda lame. *
Phil looks up and wipes away his tears. He nods.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Rohit. It’s okay. I’m not gonna turn
you in.
For the first time since we’ve seen him, Phil is relieved,
though still concerned. Elliot looks out the windows, as if
looking for something.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
If you do what I say, and pay me what
I ask, we’ll both come out of this
happy. Sitcom happy.
PHIL
(scoffs, shakes his head)
So, that is what this is about?
Money. That is all you care about.
No. If I pay you now, you will want
more and more. No matter how much I
give, you will inform the police
anyway. I won’t pay you, sir.
Remember, you also broke the law.
Elliot notices something outside the window and nods.
ELLIOT
Actually, you’re right. Partly.
7.
Elliot stands, putting his oversized bookbag on.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
After looking at your calendar, I
knew you were coming here. You always
have a nightly check-in at all of
your stores once a month. You’re a
good boss like that. I waited until
you came to this one. This one was
more convenient for me.
Phil looks around, wondering what Elliot is talking about.
PHIL
I do not understand.
ELLIOT
See, I usually do this kind of thing
from my computer. This time, I wanted
to do it AFK.
SUPER: “AFK - Away From Keyboard”
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
I’m trying to work on my social
anxiety. But there’s always the
threat of you fleeing after I call
you out. You’d tell your webmaster to
take the servers down, delete the
dirty pics and mpegs. So, I took the
liberty of making sure to include the
current time and location on my
anonymous tip--
PHIL
(desperate, nervous)
Wait, hold on! I will give you the
money. I will pay. How much do you
want?! I will pay!
Sirens can be heard. Lights swirl outside the windows.
ELLIOT
That’s the part you were wrong about,
Rohit.
(shrugs)
I was just fucking with you about the
money.
FBI AGENTS race into the shop as Elliot breezes past them,
heading out, leaving the chaos to surround the destroyed Phil.
8.
Ratings
Scene 3 - Subway Paranoia and Workplace Tensions
Back to present day, Elliot snaps awake. He eyes the two MEN
IN BLACK who still sneak looks at him.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Now I’m being followed. The higher *
ups don’t like someone with my *
powers. In three short minutes, I *
destroyed a man's business, life, *
existence. I deleted him-- *
On the far end of the packed train, a blonde man YAWNS loudly.
He looks like a disheveled Californian who’s been forced to
relocate. He wears cargo pants and what looks like a gas
attendant shirt that reads: Computer Repair With A Smile.
Below it, a logo reads MR. ROBOT (40s).
He looks at Elliot with a stoner’s smile as he brushes his
scraggly beard. Elliot doesn’t smile back. Across the crowd of
people, the man shouts:
MR. ROBOT
Hey sonny, what’s happening?
Elliot doesn’t answer. Instead, he looks away, pretending he
didn’t hear him.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
It’s an exciting time for the world
right now. An exciting time...
Mr. Robot lies on his back, returning to his homeless slumber.
EXT. NYC STREETS - LATER
Elliot walks through the crowded streets of New York,
carefully avoiding the touch of other humans. He carries a
huge bookbag on his back.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - LATER
He walks into the modest offices of AllSafe Cybersecurity, as
announced by the boring, corporate logo.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
But I’m only a vigilante hacker at
night. By day, I’m a hired one, just *
a regular cyber security engineer, *
employee number 0652.
9.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - GIDEON’S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
The AllSafe boss, GIDEON NORTON (40s), a bearded metrosexual
with adult braces sits while ANGELA (20s), a blonde girl-next-
door trapped in the prim and proper veneer of a private school
upbringing, looks down at him sternly.
ANGELA
Gideon, I can do it.
Not wanting to respond, Gideon lets his attention get
distracted by Elliot. He shouts through his glass doors:
GIDEON
Elliot, in here!
Elliot nervously walks in, curiously looking at Angela who
pretends he’s not even there. Gideon passes a file to him.
GIDEON (CONT’D)
They were hacked again. Last night.
Elliot looks over the notes.
ELLIOT
What am I looking at? Is this the
code? This was a RUDY attack.
SUPER: “RUDY Attack - Also known as R-U-Dead-Yet? This tool
attacks by starving available sessions on the web server until
they die”
Concerned, Gideon nods. Elliot shakes his head, impressed more
than he usually is.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
This is awesome--
ANGELA
Gideon, will you please answer me?
GIDEON
(to Elliot)
You think that’s awesome? This is
killing us, Elliot!
ANGELA
Gideon, I’m not leaving--
GIDEON
Angela, let’s just see how the
meeting goes today. They’re getting
hacked every week now. Who knows if
they’ll still even be with us.
10.
ELLIOT
They’re coming in?
Gideon’s look confirms it. He looks at Elliot’s hoodie.
GIDEON
What’d we say about the dress code?
Elliot sheds his hoodie, revealing an oversized, button-downed
dress shirt underneath. He hates it.
GIDEON (CONT’D)
(re: file)
Look over that, be ready this
afternoon.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - HALLWAYS
Elliot and Angela walk out. Elliot smells something on her.
ELLIOT
Did you start smoking again?
ANGELA
(ignores his question)
Did you not get my texts last night?
I sent you exactly thirteen of them.
ELLIOT
Yeah, I’m sorry, I couldn’t make it--
ANGELA
(looks at him)
You promised me that you would try
this time.
FLASHBACK: Last night, Elliot nervously walks up to the
entrance of a packed bar. Through the big windows outside he
sees Angela, laughing, smiling, drinking with friends.
Elliot’s hand goes for the door, but his hand trembles--
ANGELA (CONT’D)
Stop thinking about something else
when I’m talking to you. I hate when
you do that.
ELLIOT
Sorry, I was thinking about work.
ANGELA
You’re such a kiss-ass. Maybe that’s
why Gideon loves you so much. He
thanks me all the time for bringing
you in. But for some reason, I think
you secretly hate it here.
11.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
She was right. I liked most of the *
people, but our business-- a cyber *
security firm that protects *
corporations-- not so much. *
ELLIOT
No, it’s cool. I like it here.
ANGELA
I’m sorry, I’m just in a bad mood.
I’ve been late on my last two student
loan payments and I can’t get Gideon
to give me a raise--
A slick, good-looking Persian named ALI (20s) walks up and
kisses Angela.
ALI
(to Elliot)
Yo, bud. Missed you last night, where
were you?
ELLIOT
Gotta go. Big meeting today.
Elliot doesn’t wait for a response, he disappears into the
maze of cubicles quickly.
ALI
(to Angela)
Did you find out what happened?
ANGELA
He said he was working.
ALI
(not buying it)
Come on. You have to talk to him--
ANGELA
(rolls her eyes)
We’re gonna be late for the staff
meeting.
ALI
He can’t stand me and you know why.
Angela, I can’t have this kind of
negativity in my life--
Angela glares at him. Ali points.
ALI (CONT’D)
Exactly what I’m talking about.
12.
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Scene 4 - Birthday and Cybersecurity Concerns
A wide conference room filled to the brim with account
executives, programmers and VPs.
GIDEON
...The recent hacks on their network
have been of grave concern not only
to them, but to this company. Let’s
make sure we’re on our A game this
afternoon. But before we get into it,
I hear we have a birthday to
celebrate.
He gestures over to Angela who sheepishly smiles. Everyone
starts singing happy birthday. Cake is being passed around.
Smiles all around from the nice folks that work at AllSafe.
Elliot, his seat pushed just a little further out than the
rest, observes cautiously. On the mounted TV in the corner, *
MSNBC is playing a clip from ex-Defense Secretary Leon *
Panetta. The conversation around him drowns out as he focuses *
on the TV. *
LEON PANETTA *
...there's a strong likelihood the *
next Pearl Harbor we confront could *
very well be a cyberattack. *
MSNBC ANCHOR *
Panetta went on to say that this is *
the future of US defense spending, *
computer engineers with expertise in *
hacking. This is the new soldier, the *
intelligence soldier. *
Elliot turns to his co-worker LLOYD (20s), a Chinese engineer *
with a fro, who talks openly with a mouth full of purple
frosting. Elliot forces a smile as he passes on a piece of
cake.
CUBICLE - LATER
Elliot’s cubicle is as vanilla as a cube could be. He
furiously codes on a Linux command line, earbuds plugged in.
His fingers take quick breaks to fetch McDonald’s fries out of
the bag. Ali interrupts his work with a wave of his hand and a
phony smile as icing. Elliot reluctantly removes his earbuds.
ALI
Yo, man. Wanna do lunch today?
ELLIOT
Oh, um, yeah, I have other pla--
13.
ALI
Plans, yeah, that’s what you said the
last three times I asked you. Look,
bud, you and Angela have been close
for a long time. But, that’s even *
more reason why I want us to be on
good terms. I just feel like it’s
awkward between us, don’t you?
ELLIOT
I’m okay with it being awkward
between us.
ALI
(scoffs)
Well, it’s not okay with me. Lunch,
today. Meet me at Sharon’s Deli at
1:15. On me. It’ll be epic.
A moment’s hesitation, then Elliot nods.
ALI (CONT’D)
Cool bro.
EXT. NEW YORK STREETS - DAY
Elliot shiftlessly walks through the streets once again, big
bookbag in tow. His eyes wander around in paranoia. He
continues to eat his McDonald’s fries from the bag.
Ratings
Scene 5 - Elliot's Therapy Session
He sits across from his psychologist, KRISTA (40s), a slightly
overweight African-American woman who tries too hard at youth
with a short dress.
They’re looking at each other in silence.
KRISTA
What are you thinking about?
ELLIOT
Nothing.
KRISTA
Wanna know what I’m thinking about?
(off his look)
The first time you came to me...
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I didn’t exactly come to Krista, I *
was forced here. But I do like her. *
(then) *
Her password was simple, Dylan2791. *
Favorite artist and the year in which *
she was born, backwards. *
14.
INSERT: Krista’s Gmail, Facebook, iTunes. We land on her *
eharmony profile. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I know she got a divorce four years *
ago. I know she was devastated by it *
and has been dating losers on *
eharmony ever since. *
INSERT: A profile pic of a salt and pepper handsome gent. He’s
a pudgy, nice fellow with a friendly mustache and a welcoming
smile. His name is listed as Michael Hansen.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
Her most recent foray... Michael *
Hansen. Something about him bugs me, *
scratching that part of my mind *
again. *
Back to the scene. Elliot eyes Krista. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
Though she’s a psychologist, she’s *
really bad at reading people. But I’m *
good at reading people. My secret? I *
look for the worst in them. *
KRISTA
You were so angry. You hated
everyone. That’s what you said. And I
told you, you can’t change the system
by hating it. Do you remember that?
ELLIOT
I remember that.
KRISTA
I know you’re not yelling like
before, which is good. But I can tell
you’re still holding onto it. We have
to deal with your anger issues,
Elliot. You’re angry at everyone, at
society--
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Fuck society.
KRISTA
You have a lot to be angry about, but
keeping it to yourself, staying quiet
like you’re doing, that’s not going
to help you. There’s pain underneath.
That’s where our work needs to go.
Elliot says nothing. Krista leans in.
15.
KRISTA (CONT’D)
What is it about society that
disappoints you so much?
Elliot holds back as his eyes wander to the Apple insignia
glowing off of Krista’s laptop on her desk.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Oh, I don’t know, is it that we
collectively thought Steve Jobs was a
great man even when we knew he made
billions off the backs of children?
His eyes shift to the glass framed Tour De France poster
hanging on the wall featuring Lance Armstrong.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Or maybe it’s that it feels like all
our heroes are counterfeit, the world
itself just one big hoax.
His eyes refocus on the reflection of the glass frame, seeing
that Krista’s browser from her laptop is on Twitter.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Spamming each other with our running
commentary of bullshit masquerading
as insight, our social media faking
as intimacy.
Krista still eyes Elliot, waiting for him to respond. He
returns his stare back at her, noticing the “I voted” sticker
her on her blouse.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Or is it that we voted for this? Not
with our rigged elections-- *
His eyes now notice the expensive accessories of Krista. Her
earrings, watch, shoes, her Hunger Games book on her desk.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
But with our things, our property,
our money. But I’m not saying
anything new. We all know why we do
this. Not because earrings or the *
Hunger Games books makes us happier. *
Krista crosses her legs, still waiting on Elliot to respond.
That’s when Elliot spots a prescription bottle next to
Krista’s purse on her desk chair.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
But because we want to be sedated.
Because it’s painful not to pretend.
Because we’re fucking cowards. Fuck
society-- but I’ve said that already.
16.
He finally responds to Krista:
ELLIOT
Nothing.
Krista leans back, frustrated she’s getting nowhere.
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
Don’t be frustrated. *
KRISTA *
(confused) *
And why shouldn’t I be? *
ELLIOT *
You’re different than most. You at *
least try... you at least understand. *
KRISTA *
(intrigued) *
Understand what? *
ELLIOT *
What it’s like to feel alone. You *
understand the pain. You want to *
protect people from it. I respect *
that about you. *
Long silence. *
KRISTA *
Why do you think I know what it’s *
like to feel alone? *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
(shocked realization) *
Shit! From her emails. The dangers of *
being a hacker; have to be careful *
not to ever slip about what you *
shouldn’t know-- *
KRISTA *
Elliot? *
Unsure of what to say, Elliot stays quiet. Krista lets it go. *
KRISTA (CONT’D)
Let’s talk about last night. Did you
go to Angela’s birthday party?
FLASHBACK: Last night, we pick up where we left off. Elliot’s
hand trembles as he reaches for the door to the bar. He sweats
as he closes his eyes and tries to force himself to go in, but
can’t. The door opens, three people file out. Elliot quickly
moves out of the way, avoiding physical contact at all costs.
He takes a breath and looks through the windows again.
17.
Angela is happy, surrounded by friends, enjoying her birthday.
Ali walks up to her. They kiss. This is enough for Elliot to
wrap his head in his hoodie and walk away--
Back to the scene.
ELLIOT
Yeah. It was nice.
KRISTA
Did you try to talk to anyone?
ELLIOT
Sure, a few people. I got a girl’s
number.
KRISTA
(impressed)
You did? Are you gonna call her?
ELLIOT
I think so, yeah. She’s cute. She
likes The Hunger Games.
KRISTA
(back to being suspicious)
You’re hiding again. When you hide
like this, your delusions will come
back. It’s a slippery slope, Elliot.
(off of his uneasy shift)
Let’s talk about the men in black you
were seeing. Are they still there?
ELLIOT
No, I told you, they’re gone. The
meds you gave me helped.
Krista doesn’t buy any of this.
EXT. NEW YORK STREETS - DAY
Elliot on his way back. The MEN IN BLACK discreetly follow
him, eyeing him suspiciously. He’s so distracted by them, that
he doesn’t notice Ali standing in his way.
ALI
So, where were you? I waited half an
hour for you, man.
Still preoccupied with the MEN IN BLACK, Elliot looks around
nervously but can’t spot them anymore.
ALI (CONT’D)
Why are you such a weirdo, Elliot?
This isn’t normal, you know? You
don’t just tell people you’re going
to be somewhere and then not show up!
18.
Elliot forces himself to nod in agreement.
ELLIOT
You’re right, that does seem counter-
intuitive.
ALI
NOT cool, bro! Not cool!
(then) *
We’re going to Sharon’s Deli now.
ELLIOT
But I ate already...
(off his look, V.O.)
Fuck me, he’s not gonna let this go.
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Scene 6 - Unwelcome Reconciliation
The deli is busy with MANHATTANITES. Ali and Elliot share a
couple of seats at the counter. Ali is droning on and on about
something mundane. Elliot looks absolutely miserable.
ALI
...anyway, my point is, I think the
Beatles are okay, but very overrated,
you know? I mean, come on, there are
lots of bands that are way better.
ELLIOT
No, I don’t agree with that at all.
ALI
Well, we can agree to disagree.
He puts his arm on Elliot’s shoulder-- but Elliot, not
comfortable with the physical contact, brushes it away.
ALI (CONT’D)
Sorry, forgot about your touching
thing--
(a more sympathetic tone)
Look, I love Angela, and I want us to
try to get along for her sake--
As Ali drones on again, Elliot’s stream of consciousness
interrupts:
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
Am I that crazy to hate this guy so *
much? Among some of his Facebook *
likes are-- *
INSERT: Ali’s Facebook likes: George W. Bush’s Decision *
Points, the movie Transformers 2: Revenge of the Fallen, and *
the music of Josh Groban. *
19.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
Must I really justify my hatred any *
further? *
Back to the scene. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
(eyes Ali) *
His was the easiest to hack, password *
was 123456, then ‘seven’ spelled out. *
INSERT: Ali’s Gmail account. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I witnessed his first “I love you” *
with Angela over Gchat. *
INSERT: Profile pic of a trashy woman named Stella B. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I’ve also witnessed the first of many *
flirtations with Stella B. *
Back to the scene. Ali’s still in the midst of his phony plea.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I’ve thought about telling Angela,
but she has shitty taste in men and
I’m not quite ready to see what comes
after this just yet. Plus, I can
manage Ali easier than the others.
For now, anyway.
ALI
...but that’s all I mean. I just want
you to know that. I like you, bro.
And I want you to like me too.
ELLIOT
I understand, Ali. I’ll try harder.
ALI
That’s cool, man. Whenever you’re
ready, I’d love to just...chill--
Elliot’s phone buzzes. He looks at it. His eyes grow wide.
ELLIOT
We’ve gotta go back. They’re here.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - CUBICLE - LATER
Elliot types away at his computer.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Truth is, I shouldn’t hate Ali. He’s
not that bad a guy.
20.
ELLIOT (V.O.) (CONT'D)
He’s too dumb to be bad. In fact,
when I think about the really bad
people...
As if sensing it, Elliot stands and peeks out of his cubicle.
He sees Gideon greeting a handful of business SUITS at the
front. Angela is among the AllSafe greeters. They navigate the
SUITS towards the conference room. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
*BEEP* Corp. *
*BEEP* - (whenever the name of the company’s mentioned, it is *
bleeped out.) *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
But they might as well be called Evil *
Corp. In fact, after a thorough, *
intensive self-reprogramming, that’s *
all my mind hears, sees or reads when *
they pop up in my world. Krista would *
have a shit fit if she knew I did *
that. But that’s what they are... *
INSERT: Evil Corp’s logo, which looks like the Enron “E” logo. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
A conglomerate of Evil. *
VIDEO: Laptops, desktops, smartphones, nuclear power plants, *
guns, farms, cereal, microwaves, pills, all sporting the Evil *
Corp logo. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
It isn’t just that they indirectly *
killed or injured close to a million *
people in the last ten years... *
Back to the scene. Angela flashes a smile at Elliot before *
closing the shades of the conference room. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
It’s that they have no conscience *
about it. They’re a perfect monster. *
Elliot sits back down.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
And now, I have to help them-- *
Gideon and the team of SUITS walk up next to Elliot’s cubicle.
GIDEON
...we’ve got seven on-site engineers
on your account plus a few off-site
at the ISPs...
21.
Elliot sneaks a peek at the head suit, a bald guy who’s a dead
ringer for Steve Ballmer.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
There he is, Terry Colby, the CTO.
TERRY COLBY looks around with a doofus smile.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Even though he’s the head technology
guy at one of the biggest companies
in the world, he owns a Blackberry.
Elliot’s eyes shift to Terry’s Blackberry on his belt. Terry
looks at Elliot’s desktop with confusion.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
It also looks like he doesn’t see a
Linux operating system too often.
He’s not a techie. He’s a moron.
The suits, led by Gideon, keep on walking through the office.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
An arrogant moron. The worst kind.
Elliot goes to sit down, but a person from the pack walks up
to him. He’s good-looking, sharply dressed and has a rock star
smile. His name is TYRELL WELLICK (30s). He reaches his hand
out to Elliot. Elliot painfully takes it.
TYRELL
(thick Swedish accent)
Tyrell Wellick. Senior Vice
President, technology, Evil Corp--
Elliot quickly takes his hand back. Tyrell notices.
ELLIOT
I’m...Elliot. Just a tech.
TYRELL
Don’t be so humble. I started exactly
where you are. To be honest, my heart
has always stayed there.
(looking at his screen)
Oh, I see you’re running Ubuntu.
(off of Elliot’s impressed
look)
I’m on Red Hat myself, I know the
desktop manager is better on here,
but old habits die hard.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
An executive running Linux? But--
22.
TYRELL
I know what you’re thinking, I’m an
executive, why am I running Linux?
Again, old habits die hard.
Elliot uncomfortably smiles.
TYRELL (CONT’D)
Lookin’ forward to working with you.
I should join the rest of the group.
Bonsoir, Elliot.
He takes off with an earnest smile.
Elliot sits back down in his cubicle with a resigned sigh. He
takes in his small three-walled cube universe amidst the
thirty other identical cubes.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Sometimes I dream of saving everyone *
from the invisible hand.
Elliot eyes his fellow employees sympathetically, all looking
like enslaved serfs with their company badges hanging off
them.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
The one that brands us with an
employee badge.
His eyes look over at Lloyd who is busy paying a Verizon bill
online. He shakes his head angrily at the price.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
The one that forces us to work for
them.
EXT. NYC STREETS - NIGHT
Elliot walks through the streets alone as GROUPS OF FRIENDS
laugh while walking in and out of bars. Credit cards are
swiped, dollar-tips are thrown, a homeless man begs for
change.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
The one that controls us everyday
without us knowing it. But I can’t
stop it. I’m not that special. I’m
just anonymous. I’m just alone.
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Scene 7 - Elliot's Descent and Michael's True Colors
Elliot enters his messy small loft. A black cat named QWERTY *
greets him at the door.
23.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
If it weren’t for Qwerty, I’d be
completely empty.
She MEOWS.
MOMENTS LATER
Qwerty is chowing down on cat food. Elliot lies on the floor
next to her, petting her while she eats. He starts crying
hysterically.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I hate when I can’t hold in my
loneliness-- this crying has been
happening too often, every other week
now. What do normal people do when
they get this sad? They reach out to
friends or family, I think?
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - KITCHEN - MOMENTS LATER
Elliot crushes up morphine pills. He puts the crushed powder *
on a small glass table and cuts it with a credit card. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I do morphine. I can’t make friends. *
And family-- *
INT. ELLIOT’S HOUSE (FLASHBACK) - DAY *
A YOUNG ELLIOT (8) sits at the kitchen table. His MOTHER *
(30s), pretty but cold. Buttoned up, a short haircut, and *
expressionless face. She methodically smokes a cigarette. *
Young Elliot looks like he’s been scolded. His mother grabs *
his arm, digging her nails in until it bleeds. He goes to *
scream-- *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
That’s not an option. *
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - MOMENTS LATER *
Elliot snorts up a line of morphine. He lies back down on the *
floor as it takes effect. Qwerty plops on his stomach and *
watches him. He smiles. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
The key to doing morphine without *
turning into a junkie is to limit *
yourself to 30mg a day. Anything more *
just builds up your tolerance. I *
check every pill I get for purity, I *
have 8mg Suboxone for maintenance in *
case I go through withdrawals-- *
24.
Elliot’s eyes grow wide. He sits up slowly.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Shit!
He stands and goes to the nightstand by his bed. He goes into
his Altoids can and realizes with annoyance its empty.
He takes a deep breath and pulls out his Evil Corp smartphone.
Through the cracked screen, we see his texts:
ELLIOT: Are you home?
SHAYLA: Yeah, R U?
ELLIOT: I’m out of my pills. Can I pick some up?
SHAYLA: B up in a sec.
MOMENTS LATER
SHAYLA (30s), a tatted, hipster girl, sits across from Elliot.
She fingers out a baggie full of orange pills.
SHAYLA
You never tell me what these are for?
ELLIOT
(ignoring her)
How much?
SHAYLA
On the house.
ELLIOT
No, Shayla, not doing that. This is
just a regular drug deal, like it
always is.
Elliot offers her cash. Shayla resigns herself and takes it.
SHAYLA
What are you up to tonight? I was
gonna post a party thing on your
Facebook, but you still didn’t create
an account. I thought you said you
were going to.
ELLIOT
I never said I was going to.
SHAYLA
Why not?
ELLIOT
Because I hate Facebook.
25.
SHAYLA
(offended)
That’s crazy.
Elliot shoots her a look, “I guess I’m crazy.” Disappointed,
Shayla pulls out two white pills from her pocket.
SHAYLA (CONT’D)
Wanna do these together then? My
dealer says Lena Dunham buys them all
the time. They’re pure Molly.
The last line piques Elliot’s interest, though his look is
already regretting the decision.
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - LATER
Elliot lies naked in his bed, smoking a joint, while a nude
Shayla lies next to him, fast asleep. He wears a dumb look.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Don’t ever make decisions when you’re
on morphine.
His cell beeps. He looks at it.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Foursquare check-in for Krista at Bar
None. It’s Friday night. It has to be
with Michael. I’ve gotta go to work.
He puts on clothes and looks at Qwerty.
ELLIOT
(re: Shayla)
Keep an eye on her while I’m gone.
EXT. BAR NONE - NIGHT
Elliot, in a hoodie, walks by Bar None across the street. He
doesn’t walk towards it, instead he stays put, lurking around
the corner. He pulls out his phone and uses the camera to zoom
in through the bar’s big windows.
The camera finally lands on Krista and Michael dancing.
Michael’s goofy moves make Krista laugh.
EXT. BAR NONE - AWHILE LATER
Elliot’s camera is still on Michael from across the street as
he watches him kiss Krista goodbye. They part ways.
Elliot follows close behind as Michael walks through the
streets. Michael hails a cab. Elliot snaps a picture of the
number on top of Michael’s cab as it takes off.
He quickly pulls out his cell phone and dials.
26.
ELLIOT
(into the phone)
Yes, hi... I think I left my keys in
one of your cabs--
(looking at the picture)
Number 876496... yes, I have like a
photographic memory thing... yeah,
I’ll hold.
Elliot looks around the city block he’s standing on. In the
distance, a late night diner shows two MEN IN BLACK having
coffee. Elliot hides behind a bus stop, watching them.
Suddenly, the MR. ROBOT bum from the subway walks up to their
table, begging for money. Elliot shoots a confused look-- but
gets interrupted when the operator returns.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
350 Hawthorne Avenue. Thanks.
He hangs up and returns his gaze back to the two MEN IN BLACK.
Mr. Robot is nowhere to be seen. He lets it go for now and
returns to the task at hand.
EXT. 350 HAWTHORNE AVENUE - LATER
Elliot walks up and sees the cab, waiting by the curb. On the
stoop in front of 350 Hawthorne, Michael smokes a cigarette as
he begrudgingly walks his dog. It’s as if Michael has
completely dropped his cheery, nice guy act.
MICHAEL
Come on, asshole, piss already.
He kicks the dog, causing him to YELP.
Elliot charges from across the street.
The cowed dog looks up sheepishly at Michael as it nervously
paces around the small patch of grass.
MICHAEL (CONT’D)
Fucking GO!
He goes to kick the dog again, when Elliot finally gets there--
ELLIOT
Hey!
Michael stops and turns. Elliot looks at the dog with
sympathy, but then back at Michael.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Can I borrow your phone? Mine’s dead
and I need to call my mom.
Michael reluctantly nods and pulls out his cell. He slides it
unlocked with his passcode and hands it to him.
27.
Elliot takes it, immediately memorizing all the apps on his
homescreen, specifically the Wells Fargo app.
He dials his own number and calls. From within Elliot’s back
pocket, we see his phone light up and vibrate.
The cab, finally tired of waiting, peels out. The driver
loudly SWEARS to himself about the waste of time.
Elliot gets his own voicemail. He hangs up, quickly deletes
his call log and looks back at Michael.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
No answer. Thanks anyway.
Michael takes his phone back with a shrug.
EXT. NYC SUBWAY - LATER
Elliot walks out of the subway station, smoking a joint. His
phone immediately vibrates. He looks at it with a question,
then answers.
ELLIOT
Angela? Everything okay?
INTERCUT WITH:
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Scene 8 - The DoS Attack
Angela stands apart from Lloyd, who is desperately trying to
tackle a tech issue on his desktop.
ANGELA
(into the phone)
No, it’s not. Are you home? Were you
asleep? I’ve been trying you for
fifteen minutes.
ELLIOT
I was in the subway. What’s going on?
ANGELA
(discreet)
I need you to come to AllSafe.
ELLIOT
You’re there? It’s three in the
morning.
ANGELA
They hacked into Evil’s servers
again. But it’s bad this time. It’s a
DoS attack.
SUPER: “DoS Attack - A Denial of Service attack, an attempt to
make a machine or network unavailable to its intended users”
28.
ANGELA (CONT’D)
All their sites are down, the store,
the corporate, email, phone system,
everything.
ELLIOT
Did you call Lloyd? He’s on call--
ANGELA
Yeah, he’s here.
Lloyd slaps himself out of frustration as he types.
ELLIOT
Is he talking to Evil’s tech
department?
ANGELA
He’s online with them, but so far,
nothing. This is bad, Elliot. It’s
been down for almost an hour.
(lowered voice)
I don’t think Lloyd can fix this.
Look, Gideon just put me on this
account. I can’t fuck up the first
week. I need you. Please.
Elliot looks back into the subway. He tosses his joint.
INT. NYC SUBWAY (MOVING) - NIGHT
Elliot sits in his usual place, staring ahead, thinking-- but *
for the first time, he looks perplexed. *
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT *
Elliot races in. Angela walks up to him, panicking.
ELLIOT
Anything?
ANGELA
No. I called Gideon.
ELLIOT
Why? It’s only been down for an hour
and a half.
ANGELA
Yeah, well, an hour and a half in
Evil Corp’s time is like 13 million
dollars in revenue. Approximately. I
lied, actually, I calculated that.
That’s exactly how much they lost.
ELLIOT
Don’t worry, I got this.
29.
They approach Lloyd who is sweating bullets in his cubicle.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Lloyd, what’s the deal?
No response, Lloyd is locked in on his terminal.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Lloyd!
Lloyd snaps out of his trance and looks at Elliot.
LLOYD
Elliot. This is bad.
ELLIOT
What’s happening?
LLOYD
We’ve got server overloads on all of
them, not just the web servers.
ELLIOT
That doesn’t make any sense. Most of
the servers aren’t even exposed. Shut
down all the ports on 80--
LLOYD
I did that already, I think they
might have gotten behind the
switches.
ELLIOT
Wait a minute, I thought this was
just a DoS attack.
LLOYD
Dude, this is fucked is what this is.
ELLIOT
I’m gonna login.
Biggie’s “Somebody’s Gotta Die” RISES on the soundtrack as
Elliot types furiously on his desktop, navigating Evil Corp’s
servers. The music continues throughout this sequence as we--
INTERCUT WITH:
INT. KRISTA’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Krista walks into her clean, Ikea-furnished apartment with a
drunken smile pasted on her face. She mumbles to herself:
KRISTA
Don't fall in love, honey, come on.
It's still early. But it feels good,
it definitely feels--
30.
Her phone beeps with a text. She excitedly takes it out.
KRISTA (CONT’D)
Oh God, is that him?
MICHAEL: I miss u
She smiles as she types in a flirtatious response back.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT
Elliot finishes a can of Red Bull as he switches terminal
windows, typing furiously.
INT. ALI’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Ali is in his boxers, studiously watching THE SECRET on DVD
and writing notes on a legal pad. His laptop flashes a Skype
alert. Stella B pops up on the screen. He grins.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT
Elliot types away as Gideon walks in. Even though he’s angry,
he keeps his cool. He sees Elliot, then faces Angela.
GIDEON
Status update-- what the fuck is
going on?
ELLIOT
Someone’s taken down their servers.
GIDEON
Where is it coming from?
ELLIOT
Everywhere. USA, Finland, Thailand,
Kuwait. I can’t trace them. They got
behind the switches somehow. They’re
sending large numbers of IP packets
to everything. Evil Corp’s entire
network is crashing in on itself.
GIDEON
Swap out the switches.
Elliot continues to type as he takes his orders.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
But if I were these guys, I’d know
that and have a rootkit sitting on
the firewall sending out attacks
internally--
Elliot hits a few keystrokes hard and looks to Lloyd.
31.
ELLIOT
Mine are swapped.
LLOYD
One and two are swapped.
Angela jumps on a computer and tries to go to Evil Corp’s
website.
ANGELA
Still down.
INT. KRISTA’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Krista is in her robe, reading another text--
MICHAEL: I couldn’t resist...
Her DOORBELL goes off. She opens the door and Michael is
standing there with flowers. He passionately kisses her.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT
GIDEON
What about the firewall?
ELLIOT
I think...
Elliot taps on his computer slower now as he thinks.
GIDEON
What?
ELLIOT
I think they put a rootkit in the
firewall.
SUPER: “Rootkit - A set of software tools with administrator-
level access to a computer or network”
It starts to register to Gideon that this is bad. Very bad.
ANGELA
What’s a rootkit?
LLOYD
It’s like a crazy serial rapist with
a very big dick.
ANGELA
Jesus, Lloyd!
LLOYD
Sorry! It’s malicious code that takes
over the operating system.
32.
LLOYD (CONT'D)
It can delete system files, or worse,
install programs, viruses, worms,
anything it wants.
ANGELA
How do we stop it?
LLOYD
That’s the thing, it can make itself
invisible. They’re almost impossible
to find.
Ratings
Scene 9 - Network Meltdown
Tyrell Wellick snaps awake as his phone rings violently. He
looks at the caller ID, but isn’t pleased.
TYRELL WELLICK
(in Swedish, subtitles)
Yes? Is it absolutely necessary?
His Filipino, pregnant wife, JOANNA (30s), also stirs awake.
JOANNA
Babe?
TYRELL WELLICK
Shut up, go to sleep.
Tyrell gets out of bed, fully nude, and leaves the bedroom.
LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER
Still naked, he stands in front of his massive 70” Plasma TV.
FOX News is reporting with a banner: “EVIL CORP’S NETWORK
SUFFERS MAJOR OUTAGE”
Tyrell isn’t fazed by this.
TYRELL WELLICK
(in Swedish, subtitles)
Yes, I see it... they’ve failed
before, they’re more than welcome to
fail again.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT
Angela scans all the headlines on the news websites, then
looks over to Gideon.
ANGELA
They’re starting to report about the
outage.
33.
GIDEON
(to Elliot)
Swap out the firewall again.
ELLIOT
(typing away)
Every time I swap a server load over
to another firewall, the rootkit
replicates itself before I take the
bad one down.
(then) *
It’s defending itself. *
Everyone exchanges tense looks.
GIDEON
What’s next?
ELLIOT
(thinks)
The only thing we can do is...we have
to deliberately crash the system.
A moment as the harrowing thought sinks in. Then, Gideon
carefully unplugs a printer, picks it up and smashes it
through one of the windows of the conference room.
INT. KRISTA’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
They’ve moved to the bedroom, clothes are off as Krista climbs
on top of Michael. She closes her eyes, savoring the moment.
INT. EVIL CORP HEADQUARTERS - NIGHT
Terry Colby walks in full rage, flanked by his team of
engineers and Tyrell Wellick.
TERRY COLBY
Why do we have to shut down the whole
network? Who’s on this?
TYRELL
We have AllSafe heading to our main
server farm in Virginia.
TERRY COLBY
AllSafe? Aren’t they here?
TYRELL
We’re flying one of their engineers
out on the company jet.
TERRY COLBY
Too much time. Just have one of our
guys out in Virginia do it--
34.
TYRELL
To be honest sir, I don’t trust them.
Not with this.
TERRY COLBY
And why is that?
TYRELL *
(pause) *
Gut instinct. *
INT. PRIVATE JET (MOVING) - NIGHT
Elliot and Gideon sit silently in a small private Evil Corp
jet. Evil Corp SECURITY sit on either side of the plane.
INT. ALI’S APARTMENT
Ali’s late night video chat with Stella B gets interrupted
when he sees a text from Angela. He browses to Google News and
sees the headline, CRIPPLING HACKER ATTACK BRINGS DOWN EVIL
CORP. He logs off with Stella and calls Angela.
INT. SERVER FARM - NIGHT
Elliot speed-walks into the loud WHIRRING of the large arrays
of servers. He finds a console and terminals in.
GIDEON
Where is it?
Elliot rapidly types.
ELLIOT
Row 7A.
Both of them race through the rows of servers until they find
it. Elliot scans the arrays until he sees the right stack of
firewalls. He places his fingers on the Ethernet cables, then
nervously pauses.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Here we go.
Elliot starts ripping the cables out--
INT. KRISTA’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Krista climaxes. It’s amazing. She slowly lies next to him,
quivering with emotion. She looks at him dotingly.
KRISTA
I love you...
He kisses her--
35.
INT. SERVER FARM - NIGHT
Gideon nervously paces around the pulled firewalls that are
stacked up in a pile on the floor. Elliot is typing furiously
as he configures the newly installed firewalls. A group of
tech SPECTATORS have now formed around Elliot, watching him
with anticipation.
GIDEON
(discreet)
Come on, Elliot, they’ve been down
for six hours--
ELLIOT
Hold on...try it now.
Gideon tries the Evil Corp website. It’s back up. Gideon
breathes a sigh of relief.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Wait, ask Angela. We need to see if
it’s back up in the outside world.
Gideon video conferences Angela through his laptop.
ANGELA
(smiles)
We’re good on our end guys!
The song comes to an end as the commotion finally subsides.
The spectators CLAP. Gideon stands up proudly and squeezes
Elliot’s shoulder. Elliot shies away from the contact.
ELLIOT
I still have to finish the
configuration. Give me a minute.
GIDEON
(put off)
Okay. I’ll meet you by the bathrooms.
The spectators disperse along with Gideon. Elliot continues to
furiously type.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
They must have left a mark or
something. Every hacker loves to
gloat. They don’t just do DoS attacks
for no reason.
That’s when Elliot stumbles upon a file in the terminal that
reads simply: fsociety.
He /dir’s it and a flurry of files go flying by, the last one
being README.TXT. He opens it. It reads simply: leavemehere
36.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
This was the rootkit. Fsociety? Is
that supposed to be a joke?
Elliot steps out of the directory and types: rm fsociety/* He
takes a pause before hitting enter.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Wait. This note is for me. They’re
telling me to leave it here. But why?
Techs walk by, nervously surprising Elliot. He can’t bring *
himself to delete it-- he closes the terminal and walks away. *
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Scene 10 - Uneasy Alliance
Exhausted, Elliot and Gideon sit silently together. Though
Elliot is used to the all-nighters, Gideon isn’t. He has a
glass of wine as he sits back, deep in thought.
GIDEON
Did you know that I was gay?
ELLIOT *
Um...no.
After an awkward pause, Gideon uncomfortably nods. *
GIDEON
Consider this me coming out to you
then, okay? It’s hard, because I
don’t like to talk about my sex life.
But my partner-- he gets very
paranoid, he thinks I’m ashamed of--
you know. He wants me to be more
public about it. Anyway, I’m gay.
ELLIOT *
(awkward pause) *
Thanks. *
Deep in thought again, Gideon slowly sips his wine. Elliot
notices the troubled look on his face.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Don’t worry about it. Hackers have a
short attention span. They’ll get
bored and harass someone else--
GIDEON
Evil Corp is thinking about leaving.
And, I don’t know if I blame them...
Gideon shakes his head.
37.
ELLIOT
We have other clients.
GIDEON
We had other clients. Everyone’s
slashing their budgets, doing
security internally. Evil Corp is
seventy percent of our business right
now. We can’t lose them. I’m already
extended on our credit line. If we
lose them, that’s gonna be it for us.
That’s gonna be it for me.
Gideon takes another sip of his wine and leans back in his
chair. He looks up, hopeless, unsettled. He looks over.
GIDEON (CONT’D)
I feel like I can talk to you. More
than the others, anyway.
They share a comfortable moment this time.
GIDEON (CONT’D) *
I’m sure, in a strange way, you’ll be *
happy if we went under. *
(off his look) *
Oh, come on. I know you hate the *
stupid meetings, the birthday cake, *
wearing that shirt everyday... *
As Gideon lists off the things he supposedly hates, Elliot *
finds himself sincerely worried he’ll lose them. *
ELLIOT
Gideon?
(off his look)
I promise I’ll find them.
INT. NYC SUBWAY (MOVING) - DAY
Elliot’s drained face stares stoically out, trying to piece
together the mystery of the recent hacks. He shakes his head
sadly.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
I’ll Google fsociety when I get home. *
I’ve never seen their name on the *
boards though. They’ve gotta be new. *
But they’re good-- *
Elliot’s train of thought is interrupted when Mr. Robot sits
across from him, donning the same gas attendant shirt.
MR. ROBOT
Rough night?
38.
Shocked, Elliot’s eyes grow large.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D) *
I’m gonna leave on the next stop. I
think you should come with me.
(puts on a ski cap)
But, only if you didn’t delete it. If
you deleted it, then we have nothing
to talk about.
Mr. Robot stands and waits by the doors. Elliot sits there,
paralyzed, not knowing what to do at all.
ELLIOT
Are you talking to me?
Mr. Robot says nothing, but the empty car states the obvious.
The subway finally screeches to a halt. Elliot stands as it
stops. Mr. Robot walks off the subway. Elliot stands there for
a moment, wondering if he should follow him. He does.
PLATFORM - CONTINUOUS
Mr. Robot sits on the other side of the station. Elliot slowly
walks over and sits next to him.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Who are you?
MR. ROBOT
We’re gonna wait for the Q.
ELLIOT
And then what?
MR. ROBOT
And then we’re gonna go to Brooklyn,
out by Coney Island.
ELLIOT
Why? What’s there?
MR. ROBOT
Of course you’re gonna ask a lot of
questions. It’s weird what you’re
doing right now. I get that. Thing
is, I can’t tell you anything until
we get there.
Mr. Robot pulls out a cigarette and lights it.
ELLIOT
I don’t think you can smoke in here.
(Mr. Robot ignores him)
You’ve been following me. Why? What
do you want from me?
39.
MR. ROBOT
My dad was a petty thief. Never could
hold down a job. So, he just robbed,
convenience stores, shops, small-time
stuff. One time, he sat me down and
told me something that I never
forgot. He said, “Everyone steals,
that’s how it works. You think people
out there are getting exactly what
they deserve? No. They’re either
getting paid over or under, someone
in the chain always gets bamboozled.
I steal, but I don’t get caught,
that’s the contract I have with
society. If you can catch me
stealing, I’ll go to jail. If you
can’t, then I earn the money.”
(then) *
I respected that shit, man. As a *
little kid. I thought that was *
fucking cool. But a few years after *
that, they finally caught him, and he
goes to jail. Leaves three kids and a
wife with no money. Dies five years
after that, my respect goes with him.
I thought my dad was free, doing what
he did. He wasn’t. He was in prison.
(looks at Elliot)
Just like you are now, Elliot. But
I’m about to break you out.
Elliot shoots him a quiet, puzzled look. Mr. Robot puts on a
pair of sunglasses, smiles big and then stares ahead.
EXT. CONEY ISLAND - STREETS - DAY
An impoverished, ghetto block. Elliot cautiously follows Mr.
Robot down the street. An old Ferris wheel can be seen slowly
spinning in the distance.
They finally reach a rundown, boarded up arcade. The sign
reads: FUN SOCIETY ARCADE (but the U and N are faded). Mr.
Robot walks up to the door and grabs the key from under a dead
plant. He walks to the back, gesturing Elliot to follow him.
THE BACK - CONTINUOUS
Mr. Robot opens the backdoor. Blue, green, and gray Ethernet
cables run from all sides of the door. The sound of KEYBOARD
STROKES and CHATTER emanate from within.
Mr. Robot walks in. Elliot follows.
Ratings
Scene 11 - Introducing Fsociety
An arcade with very little working games left. Using fallen *
games as tables for computers, four hackers type away: MOBLEY
(30s) - an obese man with shaggy hair. TRENTON (16) - a nerd
eating Ramen straight from the Styrofoam bowl.
40.
MARLENE (20s) - an aggressive yet striking hipster who chain
smokes. She wears a fur coat and blue Ray Bans. ROMERO (50s) -
a long, gray-haired hippie with a fanny pack.
ELLIOT
Why would you guys actually meet IRL?
SUPER: “IRL - In Real Life”
None of them look up, all of them with earbuds plugged in as
they type away. A Depeche Mode song plays over the loud
speaker. Mr. Robot gestures for Elliot to follow him around
the corner, into the kitchen. He makes himself a glass of beer
from the tap.
MR. ROBOT
Remember LulzSec?
SUPER: “LulzSec - A computer hacker group that claimed
responsibility for several high profile attacks”
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
They got outed by their own leader to
the FBI, and six hackers went to
prison for it. How do you think they
got ‘em? They went into the dude’s
computers and tracked all of them
down through e-mails, VPN sessions,
chat messages, texts-- one guy, and
everything goes down. It’s what you
call--
ELLIOT
A central point of failure.
MR. ROBOT
(smiles)
Right. Because they didn’t meet in
person, they compromised each other
every time they sent so much as a
fucking smiley face. The rule here
is, it’s done here, and only here. It
ends when you walk out that door, and
begins when you walk in. Our
encryption is the real world.
ELLIOT
How do you talk to each other then?
Mr. Robot walks over to the popcorn machine and starts eating
straight out of it.
MR. ROBOT
We don’t. We come and go, work on the
project as much as we can.
41.
ELLIOT
(discreet)
How do you trust them?
MR. ROBOT
I have them do an exercise. If they
pass, they become one of us. If they
fail...
ELLIOT
(realizing)
The DoS attack...last night...you
were testing me?
Mr. Robot takes off his jacket as he smiles yes. Elliot peers
back to the hackers.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
You said there was a project. What’s
the project?
MR. ROBOT
(nods)
We’ll get to all of that. I just
wanted you to meet the crew and show
you the place.
They walk back into the main room. Mr. Robot sits down with
the hackers, puts his earbuds in and slaps on a pair of
sunglasses. He picks up a beast of an Evil Corp laptop and
begins typing away. Elliot stands there, unsure of how to
proceed.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
(pulls out an earbud)
Not much for you to do without a CPU.
Go get one, come back when you’re
ready.
INT. NYC STREETS - DAY *
Elliot doesn’t walk the streets so carefully this time, as his
mind swims in the mystery of what he just witnessed.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I’m fucking crazy. I have to be
fucking crazy. Because, that didn’t
just happen, right? This is a
delusion. Is this a delusion? I’m a
schizo. Really? Have I really lost it
this time. No, last night happened.
It was real. We were in Virginia. *
Evil Corp’s servers were compromised.
Those are facts, not delusions. I
know, I know, I realize I’m saying
all of this to an imaginary person--
but I created you.
(takes a breath)
I didn’t create this.
42.
INT. ELLIOT’S APARTMENT BUILDING - HALLWAY - DAY
Elliot walks into his hallway and sees Angela sitting outside
his door, smoking a cigarette by the window. She stands when
she sees him.
ANGELA
Thank God you’re here. I was just
about to go wait in that Starbucks on
the corner. You live in a bad
neighborhood, do you know that?
ELLIOT
I do know that.
She shows him a BACK TO THE FUTURE II DVD.
ANGELA
Wanna get high and watch our favorite
movie? You saved our asses last
night. I thought Gideon was
definitely going to fire me. Where
have you been? I thought you’d be
sleeping.
ELLIOT
I-- fell asleep on the train.
ANGELA
(skeptical)
Sounds like such a lie but, whatever,
I don’t wanna get into it right now.
So, you wanna do this? I miss Qwerty,
hope she’s happy to see me.
Elliot unlocks the door and they walk into the apartment.
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT
Shayla sits up, still naked. She covers herself.
ELLIOT
Oh, shit.
SHAYLA
Um, Elliot, who is this? What day is
it? It’s not Wednesday, is it?
ELLIOT
(to Angela)
Look, can I talk to you outside?
Angela, looking at Shayla’s tattoos, doesn’t register Elliot’s
question at first, but then nods.
43.
HALLWAY - MOMENTS LATER
ELLIOT
She wasn’t supposed to be here.
ANGELA *
It’s okay. This is great, Elliot. I’m *
happy for you. *
ELLIOT
It’s not like that.
ANGELA
Well, maybe it should be. It’s good
that you’re dating. *
Elliot reluctantly nods in defeat.
ANGELA (CONT’D)
And stop looking so sad.
(he looks up)
You’re always looking sad--
INT. FUNERAL RECEPTION (FLASHBACK) - DAY
YOUNG ELLIOT (14) wears black. He looks sad, but doesn’t cry.
He sits alone in the corner. YOUNG ANGELA (14), also in black,
walks up to him.
YOUNG ANGELA
You’re always looking sad.
YOUNG ELLIOT
(caught off guard)
My dad died.
YOUNG ANGELA
I know.
(she sits next to him) *
But you’ve looked sad before. I’ve
seen you.
YOUNG ELLIOT
You have?
YOUNG ANGELA
Yeah.
This makes Elliot feel good. In fact, this might be the first
smile he can remember.
YOUNG ANGELA (CONT’D)
I’m gonna go--
44.
INT. ELLIOT’S APARTMENT BUILDING - HALLWAY (PRESENT DAY)
ANGELA
I’ll see you on Monday. We’ll do
movie night next time. I promise.
Okay?
(re: Shayla)
Oh, and have fun.
Elliot nods as she walks away. Frustrated, Elliot walks into
his apartment and immediately says:
ELLIOT
Shayla, leave. NOW.
CUT TO:
INSERT: Google, 4chan, reddit, message boards, craigslist,
blogs, news sites, etc.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
No mention of Mr. Robot anywhere. No *
mention of fsociety. Not on any of *
the hacker boards. Not on 4chan, *
Reddit, Digg, Slashdot, IRC. Nothing. *
INSERT: Google maps on the fsociety arcade. *
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
Property was owned by Fun Society *
Amusement, LLC for thirteen years, *
owner was shot and killed a year and *
a half ago, no owner since. And the *
ownership history before that is *
sparse to nonexistent. This guy is *
good. Very good. Doesn’t matter. This *
is enough to turn them in. *
Elliot prints out the incriminating pages and files them in a *
blue manila envelope. *
Elliot sits back down, looking at the Google Maps picture of *
the fsociety arcade. The temptation is too strong, he cracks. *
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Scene 12 - Confusion and Tension at the Arcade
Elliot, carrying his bulky bookbag, walks through the slums of
Coney Island, back to the fsociety arcade.
Outside, Marlene sits on the curb and smokes. She has fuzzy
pink ear muffs on to protect her from the cold air.
Elliot enters through the metal gate and walks up to her. She
doesn’t say anything to him.
ELLIOT
Hey, I’m Elliot.
45.
Marlene shoots him an odd look.
MARLENE
Fucking weirdo.
(off his confused look)
When are you gonna give us the
password?
ELLIOT
What?
MARLENE
Don’t fuck with me, I wrote that
rootkit. I still have to run the IP
trace back to Colby’s laptop.
(off his confused look)
You really don’t know what I’m
talking about?
Marlene shakes her head with disgust and flicks her cigarette.
MARLENE (CONT’D)
Dickhead.
She gets up and walks towards the back, leaving Elliot
perplexed. Mr. Robot enters from the street, through the gate,
holding a grocery bag full of goodies.
MR. ROBOT
Elliot! I scored the last batch of
twinkies at Gristedes. Want one?
ELLIOT
She just called me a dickhead.
MR. ROBOT
(smiles)
Yeah, that’s Marlene.
(gestures toward the
Ferris wheel)
Hey, you like Ferris wheels?
Ratings
Scene 13 - The Ferris Wheel Confrontation
Elliot and Mr. Robot stand in a slow-moving, empty Ferris
wheel car as it does its circular motion up. Mr. Robot looks
down at the sparse crowd with a grin, eating a twinkie.
ELLIOT
I’m here to tell you that I’m turning
you in. I’m giving them the IP and
mac address, plus the logs--
MR. ROBOT
Let me tell you why you’re really
here.
46.
Confused, Elliot says nothing.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
You’re here because you sense
something wrong with the world.
Something you can’t explain, but you
know it controls you and everyone you
care about. It turns them into
slaves. And that angers you.
ELLIOT
What are you talking about?
MR. ROBOT
Money. Money hasn’t been real ever
since we got off the gold standard.
(turns to Elliot)
It’s become virtual. Software. The
operating system of our world. And
the rules are simple: those who have
less of it are forever subjugated to
those who have more of it.
ELLIOT
Money? Is that what you and your
little family back there do? Steal
money?
MR. ROBOT
(offended)
This isn’t the mafia. We’re not a
family. Family members trust each
other, and that’s what usually fucks
them. This isn’t about trust, it’s
about freedom.
ELLIOT
Any of those guys back there can call
the cops on you anytime. Fuck, they
can call the cops on me.
MR. ROBOT
They’d do that whether I trusted them
or not. They’re selfish, just like
everyone else. They’re gonna always
do what’s in their best interest, and
as long as I know that, everyone’s on
the level. Right now, it would be in
no one’s interest to call the cops.
Not when we’re this close.
ELLIOT
Close? To what?
Mr. Robot’s smile returns.
47.
MR. ROBOT
Well, Elliot, we’re on the verge of
taking down this virtual reality.
(gestures outside)
The one out there.
ELLIOT
(long stare)
Are you crazy? Is that what this is?
Are you some crazy rich man that’s on
mescaline or something--
MR. ROBOT
It’s pure economics. What if you took
down one conglomerate-- a
conglomerate so deeply entrenched in
the world economy, that too big to
fail doesn’t even come close to
describing it.
ELLIOT
(skeptical)
Doesn’t exist. They’d find some way
around it, they always do--
MR. ROBOT
We’ve run the simulations. Even in
the best case scenarios, this
conglomerate’s collapse couldn’t be
saved.
(eats another twinkie)
And if this conglomerate goes down,
well...it’d be a domino effect. Every
crony partner company dependent on
them would fall shortly after. Their
bought governments after that. In
eight months, their entire empire
would be erased from history.
ELLIOT
You want to create another financial
meltdown? Like the one we just had,
but way worse? Why would I want that?
Everyone would lose their money--
MR. ROBOT
What if I were to say that this same
conglomerate also happens to own
seventy percent of the global
consumer credit industry? That if we
hit their data centers right, we
could systematically format all the
servers, including backup--
ELLIOT
That would erase--
48.
MR. ROBOT
All the debt we owe them. Every
record of every credit card, loan and
mortgage-- wiped clean. Without a
single digital trace, it’d be
impossible to reinforce outdated
paper records. It’ll be gone-- the
biggest single instance of wealth
redistribution in history.
Elliot realizes what he’s talking about. To underline this, he
sees an Evil Corp logo proudly displayed on top of a building
in the horizon.
ELLIOT
The conglomerate. This is about Evil
Corp.
(off his look)
That’s why you picked me. Because I
work at AllSafe.
Mr. Robot hands him a slip of paper with an IP address.
MR. ROBOT
Tomorrow, AllSafe is going to get a
visit from the FBI and the US Cyber
Command. Put this IP trace on the
rootkit with the diagnostics you give
them. Trenton found Colby’s encrypted
laptop address from Facebook.
ELLIOT
You wanna frame Terry Colby for the
hack? No one’s gonna believe that. I
met him, he’s a moron.
MR. ROBOT
So are the FBI. Even if they don’t
believe he did it, they’ll believe he
gave someone access to it.
ELLIOT
But, he’ll just go to jail. What will
that do?
MR. ROBOT
You don’t take down a conglomerate by
shooting them once in the heart.
That’s the thing about conglomerates,
they don’t have hearts. You take them
down, limb by limb. And once they
unravel...
(gestures out to the
people)
Their illusion of control goes with
it.
49.
Elliot takes a hard look at Mr. Robot, questioning his
seemingly altruistic motives.
ELLIOT
Who are you?
Mr. Robot lights a cigarette.
MR. ROBOT
That’ll all come later. You have a
lot to think about it. You have to
turn in that report tomorrow, and
Colby’s IP trace has to be in it. You
do that, and you will have set in
motion the biggest revolution the
world will ever see.
Elliot’s look of doubt is all but whittled away.
ELLIOT
What if I get caught?
MR. ROBOT
If you can get caught, then you're
not good enough to do this.
ELLIOT
(challenged but confident)
What makes you think I would do this
anyway? What makes you think I give a
shit about Evil Corp?
Mr. Robot nods, fair question. He lifts himself up on the old *
Ferris wheel car, as it squeaks loudly. He stands on the edge, *
holding onto the sides as it swings high above. *
ELLIOT (CONT’D) *
What are you doing-- *
MR. ROBOT *
I know you feel pain, Elliot. I know *
you feel loneliness. We all do. It’s *
not our fault. We want the pain to *
stop. Not the bullshit pain people *
cry about on blogs, but real pain-- *
Mr. Robot lets go of one of the sides as he looks down below *
at the hard pavement. The OPERATOR down below sees Mr. Robot. *
OPERATOR *
Hey! What are you doing? Are you *
crazy?! *
MR. ROBOT *
GO FUCK YOURSELF! *
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OPERATOR *
ASSHOLE! *
Mr. Robot closes his eyes as he ponders jumping. He’s *
immediately filled with emotion. *
MR. ROBOT *
I’m so fucking tired of our only *
options being to put our heads down *
or get knocked the fuck down-- *
Mr. Robot tears up from the deep sadness. He turns to face *
Elliot, letting go of both sides, balancing himself with only *
his legs as the old car swings. A small crowd has now formed *
below to watch the impending jumper. *
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D) *
I want my head up! I want to see the *
world for the first time, not through *
their eyes, not what they allow me to *
see, but what I want to see-- *
The Ferris wheel starts its decline as the infuriated operator *
hurriedly tries to bring it back. Mr. Robot’s balance wavers *
as the car moves. He slips and almost falls back-- *
The crowd gasps as they point-- *
Mr. Robot reaches for the side of the car but can’t grab it-- *
Elliot leaps forward and grabs Mr. Robot’s hand. Mr. Robot *
holds his hand. It’s a rare moment of human contact for *
Elliot, and it’s powerful. Mr. Robot climbs back into the car *
with a smile. *
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
I know you know what I’m talking
about. It’s the part of you that
didn’t delete the rootkit. It’s that
part of you that told you to come
back here. It’s that part of you that
hates Evil Corp for killing your
father.
Elliot is speechless.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
Put that fucking IP trace in the
diagnostic tomorrow.
The ride finally finishes. Their carriage returns.
MR. ROBOT (CONT’D)
(eats another twinkie)
Looks like our ride is over.
51.
Ratings
Scene 14 - Elliot's Plan for Angela's Debt
Elliot walks fast as a small smile begins to grow on his face.
He listens to Neil Diamond’s “If You Go Away.” He stops short
to see a billboard of a college student with a sad face. The
copy reads: “How am I ever going to pay back my student
loans?” Underneath: EVIL CORP
NEIL DIAMOND
If you go away on this summer day
INT. NYC SUBWAY (MOVING) - NIGHT
Elliot can’t contain the flurry of emotions pulsing through
his entire body. The intercom is in the midst of playing a
commercial:
SUBWAY INTERCOM
--just log on to www.evilcorp.com to
purchase now...
(repeating)
Hello! Wanna save on your health
insurance premiums? At Evil Corp, we
not only laugh at you for thinking
that, but we charge you more for
it...
Sensing Elliot’s excitement, a CHILD smiles at him. Touched,
Elliot smiles back. The MOM, noticing the exchange, shoots a
friendly look at Elliot.
NEIL DIAMOND
Then you might as well take the sun
away
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - NIGHT
Elliot types away on his computer, we see text as he’s
skipping around. HuffPost - Mortgage lenders now have more
equity in U.S. homes than Americans. BBC - The global gap
between rich and poor is at its highest level for 20 years and
growing. NY TIMES - Debt Slavery, The New American Dream.
He pulls up another browser window and logs into Citibank’s
site. We see that the account belongs to Angela. He clicks
through her statements and lands on her private Evil Corp
student loans. She owes $197,455.64.
Elliot looks over at Mr. Robot’s slip of paper next to him. He
opens a new command-line and begins typing up the report.
MOMENTS LATER
The final pages of the new diagnostic report prints out. He
places the report in a red manila envelope.
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MOMENTS LATER
Faintly smiling, Elliot sleeps soundly in his bed. The E logo
of Elliot’s Evil Corp desktop pulses in sleep mode, casting a
shadow on Elliot periodically.
NEIL DIAMOND
If you go away, as I know you must
INT. NYC SUBWAY - PLATFORM - LATER
As Elliot waits for the subway, he stares at a poster for a
blockbuster movie called VILLAINS, the tagline reads: Evil
Always Wins.
NEIL DIAMOND
There'll be nothing left in this
world to trust
The MEN IN BLACK on the platform sneak Elliot looks. Elliot’s
excitement from the night before starts a slow descent.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NEXT MORNING
WORKERS file in for another day, but the mood is somber. Terry
Colby and his Evil Corp executives are crowded in the
conference room. FBI Agents are also walking in and out.
Gideon looks stressed. The air is thick with tension. Colby
wants someone’s head on a platter.
Angela walks in with a worried look. Ali walks in, sharing the
same look of dread as everyone else.
NEIL DIAMOND
Just an empty room, full of empty
space
Elliot nervously walks in, eyeing his blue and red manila
envelopes. The smile from the night before is now but a
distant memory.
NEIL DIAMOND (CONT’D)
Like the empty look, I see on your
face...
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - CONFERENCE ROOM - LATER
Gideon, AllSafe account executives, FBI, Evil Corp execs,
Tyrell and Terry Colby himself surround the expansive table.
The red manila envelope sits in front of Elliot. He’s sweating
profusely as he swaps the red back into his bag for the blue. *
He shakes his head in disappointment. *
Tyrell Wellick notes the folder swap.
53.
NEIL DIAMOND
The good's gone from goodbye, if you
go away, if you go away, if you go
away....
TERRY COLBY
So, what do we got?
GIDEON
So, if you take a look at the first
page of the agenda--
Everyone flips over one page of their packet. Terry looks over
at Elliot. Elliot nervously looks back.
TERRY COLBY
You’re the one we sent to Virginia?
(off Elliot’s nervous nod)
Great work. The gals in analysis said
this was a tough one. All things
being equal, that should have shut us
down for days. So, you did good.
ELLIOT
(uncomfortable)
Okay.
Gideon tries to move on.
GIDEON
We should start with our account
executive, Angela, who handled the
initial alert. Elliot comes in later.
Angela awkwardly waves. Terry isn’t impressed.
TERRY COLBY
Okay then. What do we have, Angela?
Walk us through this thing.
ANGELA
We first noticed the breach at 2:07
A.M. Eastern Standard on Friday night-
TERRY COLBY
You mean, Saturday?
ANGELA
Sorry, yes, Saturday. Technically,
Saturday morning.
TERRY COLBY
(condescending)
Yeah, Angela, that’s what we’re here
for. The technicals.
Noting the condescension, Angela hides her anger.
54.
ANGELA
Right, I’m sorry. Anyway, he arrived
at the office at 2:35--
TERRY COLBY
So, almost a half hour after the
initial breach? Why didn’t anyone
pipe in from their laptops?
ANGELA
It’s not protocol--
ELLIOT
It wouldn’t have been secure if
someone terminaled in on this. It
would have put the servers at more
risk. It was the smarter move to have
someone come in so they can login on
a secure line.
ANGELA
(annoyed)
Exactly. Then Lloyd was able to--
TERRY COLBY
Actually, one sec, hon.
Terry gestures to Gideon. Gideon leans in and Terry whispers
something in his ear. From the look on Gideon’s face, it’s not
good. Angela looks like she’s gonna flip out.
After the brief exchange, Gideon walks over to Angela and
relays the message. Angela angrily collects her papers and
walks out of the conference room.
TERRY COLBY (CONT’D)
(to Elliot)
Let’s pick it up where you left off.
ELLIOT
What happened to Angela? She was the
account exec on this--
TERRY COLBY
She’s not gonna work out for us. Not
on this level. We wanna stick to the
more tech savvy here. Now, let’s get
right to the heart of this thing,
because I can’t sit here and read a
packet for the next twenty minutes.
Who did this? Were you guys able to
find that out or not?
Elliot’s eyes shift back and forth between the embarrassed
Angela who is walking down the hallway, the red manila
envelope still in his bag and Terry Colby’s curious look.
Elliot instantly gains courage. He swaps the blue manila for
the red.
55.
ELLIOT
I have all the diagnostics right
here. We were able to track down the
IP address, including the traceroute.
Timestamped and everything. I will
also provide an encrypted PDF
version.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - ELLIOT’S CUBICLE - LATER
Elliot nervously watches from his cubicle as the FBI, Colby
and the rest of the execs examine the diagnostics.
His eyes wander to the head of the office to glimpse Angela
talking to Gideon. Gideon hugs her as she walks out the door.
Gideon walks over to Elliot and Lloyd’s cubicle.
ELLIOT
Is she gonna be okay?
GIDEON
Yeah, I told her to take the rest of
the day off. I’m gonna move her off
the Evil Corp account. I’m gonna
assign Ali to you guys.
Elliot eyes Ali across the way. Elliot sinks in his seat and
shakes off the disturbing thought. His eyes shift back to the
FBI and Colby. He looks at you with concern. *
*
CUT TO BLACK.
FADE IN:
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - MORNING
Elliot hasn’t slept and it shows. He quickly checks his phone.
Google alerts: 0. He busts out his laptop and quickly searches
around news blogs and hacker boards. His face falls.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Nineteen days... no news, no arrests, *
no revolution.
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Scene 15 - Elliot's Manipulative Confrontation
Elliot looks around for Mr. Robot.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
No Mr. Robot on the subway.
EXT. CONEY ISLAND - DAY
Elliot walks by the fsociety arcade, but it’s abandoned. No
wires, no hackers, no Mr. Robot.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
No signs of anyone at the arcade.
56.
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - DAY
Elliot walks in, he sees Angela ahead of him. She’s dyed her
hair jet black. He tries to catch up and say hi, but she gives
him the cold shoulder.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
(eyes the empty conference
room)
No FBI, Colby, Evil Corp. Maybe Mr. *
Robot was wrong after all. *
INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - CUBICLE - LATER
Bored, Elliot stares at his computer screen. A banner ad for
the movie VILLAINS flashes on a website.
EXT. NYC STREETS - DAY *
Elliot walks down the street on his cell.
ELLIOT
Hi, this is Sam from Wells Fargo
security fraud department.
Unfortunately, we have to inform you
that your account has been
compromised.
MICHAEL (O.S.)
What? Really? What happened?
ELLIOT
First, before I can continue, I need
to verify some information. Are you
still at 350 Hawthorne Avenue?
MICHAEL (O.S.)
Yes. Apartment 2C.
ELLIOT
Great. And the last four of your
social security?
MICHAEL (O.S.)
Umm...6457.
ELLIOT
Mother’s maiden.
MICHAEL (O.S.)
Faben.
ELLIOT
And your security question...
A painful pause on the phone.
57.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I always stretch for this one.
MICHAEL (O.S.)
Oh, um, I think, dog’s name. Flipper.
Wasn’t it that?
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - NIGHT
Elliot sits in front of his rundown, stickered up Evil Corp
desktop as a command line program runs password checks with
the keywords Elliot has inputted.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
With those details plus a dictionary *
hack, it’ll take my program maybe two *
minutes to crack his password. *
While he waits, Elliot goes on Facebook and looks up Angela.
He scans through the pictures of her and Ali. Christmas
vacations, Halloween, beach parties, barbecues, etc.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
What I wouldn’t give to be normal. To
live in that bubble, the reality of
the naive.
He switches Facebook accounts to Krista, his therapist. More
happy pictures of families, vacations, friends.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
That’s how I justify this. To keep
their optimism intact. To protect
them.
His password program BEEPS. He switches screens hurriedly and
discovers the program didn’t come up with a single match.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
How? He’s too old to have a
complicated password. It had to have
been a combination of these things.
Elliot puts his head down and thinks.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
I’m missing something. I’m missing
something. I’m missing something.
He closes his eyes. He slouches as he rocks back and forth in
his chair. His leg twitches rapidly as he mumbles thoughts to
himself. Finally, he looks up at his screen.
ELLIOT (V.O.) *
His phone number. *
He quickly goes on Google and does a reverse look-up on
Michael’s phone number.
58.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Michael Hansen isn’t his real name.
Elliot sits back, disappointed.
EXT. 350 HAWTHORNE AVENUE - NIGHT
Michael walks down his street carrying a screaming baby. His
WIFE walks next to him. They exchange words before she heads
into the corner convenience store and he walks towards their
apartment building, baby in arms. Elliot sits on his stoop, in
his hoodie, smoking a cigarette, waiting for him.
Elliot’s silhouette takes Michael by surprise.
ELLIOT
You’re gonna stop seeing Krista.
The sound of her name immediately makes Michael’s eyes grow
wide. Elliot stands and faces him. The baby cries.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
You’re gonna break up with her
tonight and you’re never going to see
her again.
MICHAEL
(recognizing him)
You’re the guy that used my phone--
ELLIOT
You cheated on your current wife with
seven different women and I have
digital proof of all of this.
Stunned, Michael remains still. His wife stands in line at the
checkout.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Ashley Madison, online escorts, fake
Facebook pages. I have it all. And if
you don’t break up with Krista
tonight, your wife will know
everything along with the police.
MICHAEL
The police?
ELLIOT
Two of the escorts were fifteen.
Michael puts his head down with a wince. The baby screams
louder.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
That part I made up. But he did have
a proclivity for young escorts that
helped the lie.
59.
ELLIOT
But I’m not going to do any of that
as long as you break up with Krista.
Tonight.
Michael looks up at him, now out of fear. His wife is putting
away her wallet and is about to walk out.
MICHAEL
Done. I’ll breakup with her--
ELLIOT
You’re also gonna tell her the truth.
That you’re married. That you cheat
on your wife. That you hire
prostitutes. That you never had any
intention of being serious with her.
MICHAEL
Why? That would destroy her.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Exactly. Krista needs to avoid
dickheads like you in the future. Her
radar needs fixing.
ELLIOT
I’ll know if you skip a detail. So
don’t, or the emails go beaming out.
Michael nods quickly as his wife exits the store.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Oh, and one last thing. Need you to
go upstairs and get something for me.
INT. ELLIOT’S LOFT - NIGHT
Elliot brings Michael’s dog, Flipper, home-- much to the
chagrin of Qwerty.
ELLIOT
Come on, Qwerty, he’s nice.
Qwerty isn’t happy, her back raised as she scurries to the top
of the kitchen counters.
Elliot gives the dog some water. He laps it up happily.
ELLIOT (CONT’D)
Good boy.
MOMENTS LATER
Elliot is on his computer burning a CD. The folder he’s
copying is called MICHAEL HANSEN FILES. Once the burn is
complete, he pulls out a sharpie and labels it PINK FLOYD -
WISH YOU WERE HERE.
60.
He grabs a large CD Case from underneath his bed and flips it
open. Several other CDs labeled everything from the BEATLES to
ZEPPELIN are in there. He files the newly fake-labeled CD and
sends the envelope back under his bed.
He jumps back on his computer and deletes the Michael Hansen
folder. With a small hope in his eyes, he checks his browser
for news alerts again. Nothing. He goes to bed.
INT. PSYCHOLOGIST’S OFFICE - DAY
Elliot sits in his usual chair. He looks at Krista, who looks
disheveled and completely out of it.
ELLIOT
Krista?
(off her look)
Are you okay?
KRISTA
(clears her throat)
Sorry. I’m fine. Go on.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
The look of disillusionment. He told
her. She cried all night. Now comes
the sadness. I don’t like seeing her *
sad.
ELLIOT
I think Angela blames me for what
happened with the Evil Corp meeting.
What do I do? I need to talk to her.
KRISTA
I think you just answered your own
question.
(off his look)
Talk to her.
ELLIOT
But she won’t respond to any of my
texts or emails--
KRISTA
Go to her apartment, knock on her
door and tell her you need to talk.
(pointed)
Communication is key, Elliot. Real
human interaction. That’s what’s
important for you right now.
Elliot takes in the ground-breaking idea.
EXT. ANGELA’S APARTMENT - NIGHT
He knocks, then nervously waits for Angela to open the door.
61.
She does. It’s clear by the look on her face she’s as shocked
as he is that he’s there.
After a hesitation, Angela lets him in.
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Scene 16 - Unresolved Confrontation and Mysterious Arrest
Elliot looks around her apartment. It’s well kept, friendly
and warm. It’s the opposite of his place. CNBC plays muted on
the flatscreen hanging on the wall.
ANGELA
What’s going on?
ELLIOT
You won’t talk to me. You haven’t
talked to me since the Evil Corp
meeting--
ANGELA
I don’t want to talk to you, because
I feel embarrassed every time I think
about what happened. I’ll get over
it, it’s fine.
ELLIOT
It’s been three weeks--
ANGELA
You didn’t have to take care of me in
there. I know you were trying to
help, but just don’t do it again.
Even if I’m losing. Let me lose.
Okay?
(off his confused look)
Don’t look confused, just say okay.
Elliot nods. She puts her head down, disappointed in herself.
Though this is awkward for him, Elliot slowly hugs her.
ANGELA (CONT’D)
Elliot... I’m sorry...
A momentary hesitation as they eye each other. The moment
quickly feels like it could be a kiss. But then Elliot
realizes Angela’s eyes are looking behind him. He turns.
ON TV:
Terry Colby is arrested by FBI and taken into custody. A CNBC
banner reads:
BREAKING - CTO of Evil Corp, Terry Colby, has been arrested
for his alleged role in Evil’s high-profile hacking.
Elliot’s eyes go wide.
62.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
No fucking way.
Angela turns up the volume. *
ON TV:
TERRY COLBY
No comment, no comment, no comment.
NEWS REPORTER
FBI agents claim that Colby either
used hacking groups or worked in
conjunction with them to pressure
Evil Corp during his contract
negotiations. After a long and
exhaustive investigation, sources
close to the FBI have confirmed that
the hacks were in part tied to Terry
Colby’s personal laptop.
EXT. NEW YORK STREETS - DAY
Elliot walks down the street, no longer in a zombified,
shiftless state-- but with life and purpose.
He looks at his phone. News alert headlines read: EVIL CORP’S
STOCK DOWN ON NEWS OF CYBERCRIME.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
(incredulous)
It’s happening. It’s happening. It’s
happening. It’s happening.
Elliot stops in Times Square and looks at the TV’s around him
announcing news of the disastrous Evil Corp scandal.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Maybe I can change the system by
hating it!!
He stretches his arms out like he’s just won the gold--
A limo screeches to a halt in front of him. A MAN IN BLACK
jumps out and opens the door. Elliot’s smile is long gone.
MAN IN BLACK
Sir, step inside the car.
Other MEN IN BLACK stand behind Elliot. Sweating immediately,
Elliot even notices POLICE looking the other way.
MAN IN BLACK (CONT’D)
Sir. Get inside the vehicle. Now.
Helpless, Elliot slowly climbs in. The limo peels out. *
63.
INT. LIMO (MOVING) - DAY
Elliot sits across from two other MEN IN BLACK. An eerie
silence is the only sound that occupies the limo.
INT. SKY RISE - ELEVATOR (MOVING) - DAY
A nervous wreck, Elliot stands in the high speed elevator as
it quickly climbs several stories into the air.
The elevator DINGS when it reaches the top floor. The MAN IN
BLACK by the doors opens the digital latch with his phone. The
doors open and almost immediately we hear LOUD ARGUING.
MAN IN BLACK
Go ahead.
ELLIOT
(nervous)
Where are we?
MAN IN BLACK
Sir, go on in.
INT. TOP FLOOR - CONTINUOUS
Elliot enters alone. He sees a number of MEN circle around a
grand conference table. We only see their silhouettes, as they
bicker and argue with one another.
Elliot’s silhouette now joins them, dead center in the mess of
black outlines.
Realizing that Elliot has shown up, their loud arguing hushes
into an abrupt silence. The dark shadows now face Elliot, who
remains catatonic.
What follows is the longest silence of Elliot’s life as he and
the dark faces exchange long, tense stares. No one speaks.
ELLIOT (V.O.)
Please tell me you’re seeing this
too...
Loud, violent jazz RISES again as we push into the darkness of
the menacing silhouettes, until the screen is filled with...
BLACK.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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elliot | Elliot starts off as a socially isolated hacker with insomnia and paranoid delusions, using his hacking abilities to navigate the world of cybersecurity. As he delves deeper into exposing corruption and protecting others, he grapples with his own personal demons and inner struggles. Through a series of challenges and moral dilemmas, Elliot learns to confront his fears, trust others, and find a balance between his desire for justice and his own well-being. Ultimately, he emerges as a reluctant hero, using his skills for good and making a difference in the world. | The character arc for Elliot is well-developed, showcasing his growth from a troubled loner to a reluctant hero. However, there could be more emphasis on his internal struggles and emotional journey, providing a deeper exploration of his motivations and conflicts. Additionally, the arc could benefit from more nuanced interactions with other characters, allowing Elliot to form meaningful relationships and confront his vulnerabilities. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more moments of vulnerability and emotional depth for Elliot. Show his internal struggles more explicitly, highlighting the impact of his insomnia, paranoia, and addiction on his actions and relationships. Develop his interactions with other characters to provide a contrast to his isolated nature, allowing for growth and connection. Additionally, explore his moral ambiguity and conflicting desires in greater detail, adding complexity to his journey towards becoming a hero. |
angela | Angela starts as a frustrated girl-next-door trapped in the corporate world, seeking recognition and validation. As she transitions into a cybersecurity professional, she faces challenges in a male-dominated industry but remains loyal to her colleagues and committed to her work. Despite setbacks and manipulation, Angela learns to balance her vulnerability with her strength, ultimately finding empowerment and success in her career. | The character arc for Angela is well-developed, showcasing her growth from a conflicted individual to a resilient professional. However, there could be more clarity in depicting her internal struggles and how they shape her decisions and relationships throughout the screenplay. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that delve into Angela's emotional journey and the impact of her vulnerabilities on her interactions with others. Show her growth through meaningful dialogue and actions that highlight her resilience and determination, ultimately leading to a satisfying resolution in her personal and professional life. |
gideon | Gideon starts off as a boss concerned about cybersecurity breaches and the future of his company. As the story progresses, he becomes more involved in crisis situations, showcasing his leadership qualities and expertise. Eventually, he opens up to Elliot about his personal struggles, showing vulnerability and a desire for connection. | The character arc for Gideon is well-developed, showing a progression from a stressed boss to a more open and vulnerable individual. However, there could be more depth added to his personal struggles and how they impact his decisions and interactions with other characters. | To improve the character arc, consider delving deeper into Gideon's personal challenges and how they affect his relationships with other characters. Show more of his internal struggles and growth throughout the story to make his character more dynamic and relatable. |
mr. robot | Mr. Robot starts off as a mysterious figure who guides Elliot in his hacking endeavors, pushing him to challenge the system and question his beliefs. As the story progresses, it is revealed that Mr. Robot is actually a manifestation of Elliot's subconscious, representing his desire for change and rebellion against societal norms. This realization leads to a conflict within Elliot as he grapples with his own identity and struggles to come to terms with his past. Ultimately, Mr. Robot serves as a catalyst for Elliot's growth and transformation, pushing him to confront his fears and embrace his power. | The character arc for Mr. Robot is well-developed and provides a compelling journey for both him and Elliot. However, there could be more clarity in the transition from Mr. Robot being a separate entity to being a part of Elliot's subconscious. This shift could be more clearly foreshadowed throughout the story to make the revelation more impactful. | To improve the character arc, consider incorporating subtle hints and clues early on that suggest Mr. Robot's true nature as a manifestation of Elliot's subconscious. This could create a sense of mystery and intrigue for the audience, leading to a more satisfying payoff when the truth is revealed. Additionally, exploring the internal conflict within Elliot as he grapples with his dual identity could add depth to both characters and enhance the emotional resonance of the story. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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High Overall Grade Scenes | Scenes with an overall grade of 9 or above tend to have a higher score in the Emotional Impact and Conflict categories. |
Dialogue and Character Scores | Scenes with higher Dialogue scores generally have higher Character scores as well. |
Tense and Suspenseful Scenes | Scenes with tones that are classified as Tense or Suspenseful often receive high scores in the Plot, Conflict, and Move Story Forward categories. |
Introspective and Paranoid Scenes | Scenes with tones that are classified as Introspective and Paranoid tend to have lower scores in the High Stakes category. |
Character Changes and Emotional Impact | Scenes that feature significant Character Changes often have higher scores in the Emotional Impact category. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenwriter showcases a strong command of storytelling techniques, effectively crafting scenes that draw the audience into the narrative and establish tension, character dynamics, and thematic depth. The dialogue is sharp and engaging, driving the plot forward while revealing the characters' motivations and conflicts. However, there are opportunities for further refinement and development to enhance the screenplay's overall impact.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Screenplay | Read 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into screenplay structure, character development, and scene pacing, addressing key improvement areas identified in the analysis. |
Exercise | Practice writing character biographies and conducting character interviews to dive deeper into their motivations and backstories.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will aid in developing well-rounded characters with compelling emotional journeys. |
Video | Watch films with distinct character voices and analyze how dialogue contributes to characterization. | Studying effective dialogue in films helps refine the writer's ear for authentic and engaging character voices. |
Screenplay | Study screenplays known for their tight pacing and masterful scene transitions. | Analyzing successful examples of scene pacing and transitions will enhance the writer's ability to create a smooth and captivating flow in their own work. |
Course | Enroll in a screenwriting course or workshop focused on character development and dialogue writing. | Structured learning and feedback from experienced instructors can accelerate the writer's progress in these areas. |
Stories Similar to this one
Story | Explanation |
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Mr. Robot | Both involve a young man with mental health issues who is recruited by a mysterious group of hackers to take down a corrupt corporation. |
Fight Club | Both involve a young man who is drawn into a secret organization that is fighting against a corrupt and oppressive system. |
The Social Network | Both involve a young man who creates a successful tech company, but must grapple with the ethical and personal consequences of his actions. |
Silicon Valley | Both involve a group of young tech entrepreneurs who are trying to create a successful startup company. |
The Matrix | Both involve a young man who discovers that the world he knows is a simulation, and must fight against a powerful group that is trying to control it. |
Blade Runner | Both involve a young man who is trying to find his place in a world that is increasingly controlled by technology. |
The Catcher in the Rye | Both involve a young man who is struggling with his identity and his place in the world. |
1984 | Both involve a young man who is living in a totalitarian society, and must fight against the government to regain his freedom. |
The Book Thief | Both involve a young person who is coming of age in a difficult and dangerous world. |
The Fault in Our Stars | Both involve a young person who is dealing with a serious illness. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Unreliable Narrator | Elliot refers to himself as having chronic insomnia, believing in aliens, and a shadowy group of rich people secretly running the world. | The trope of an unreliable narrator is a character whose point of view is not considered reliable by the audience. This can be due to the character being mentally ill, delusional, or simply lying. |
Deus Ex Machina | Elliot's meeting with Mr. Robot on the subway and his subsequent recruitment into fsociety. | Deus ex machina is a plot device whereby a seemingly unsolvable problem is suddenly and unexpectedly resolved by an outside force. |
Anti-Hero | Elliot is a morally ambiguous character who is willing to break the law and hurt others to achieve his goals. | An anti-hero is a protagonist who lacks the traditional heroic qualities of courage, nobility, and selflessness. |
Paranoia | Elliot's belief that he is being followed and that a shadowy group is out to get him. | Paranoia is a mental state characterized by excessive fear and suspicion. |
Hackers as Heroes | Elliot and Mr. Robot are portrayed as skilled hackers who use their abilities to take down the corrupt Evil Corp. | Hackers as heroes is a trope where hackers are depicted as positive figures who use their skills to fight for good. |
Vigilante Justice | Elliot's decision to take down Evil Corp by hacking into their systems and erasing all the debt records. | Vigilante justice is the act of taking the law into one's own hands. |
Guyliner | Elliot's use of eyeliner, which is often associated with emo culture. | Guyliner is the use of eyeliner by men. |
The Fourth Wall | Elliot's direct address to the audience through voiceover. | The fourth wall is the invisible barrier between the actors and the audience. |
Red Herring | The film's suggestion that Mr. Robot is Elliot's imaginary friend, only to later reveal that he is real. | A red herring is a clue that is intentionally misleading. |
Unresolved Sexual Tension | The tension between Elliot and Angela, which is hinted at throughout the film but never fully resolved. | Unresolved sexual tension is a situation in which two characters have a strong attraction to each other but do not act on it. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Alienation and Loneliness | - Elliot is isolated and alone, with few close relationships. - He struggles to connect with others and often feels like an outsider. - His only true companion is his cat, Qwerty. | Elliot's sense of alienation and loneliness is a key part of his character. It drives him to seek out connections with others, even if those connections are ultimately unsatisfying. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Alienation and Loneliness:
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Identity and Reality | - Elliot's perception of reality is often unreliable. - He suffers from delusions and hallucinations. - He is unsure of who he is and what his purpose is. | Elliot's struggles with identity and reality are a central part of the series. They raise questions about the nature of truth and the limits of human understanding. | ||||||||||||
Technology and Power | - Technology is a powerful force in Elliot's life. - He uses it to hack into systems and manipulate people. - He is aware of the dangers of technology, but he is also drawn to its power. | Technology is a double-edged sword in Mr. Robot. It can be used for good or for evil, and it is up to the individual to decide how to use it. | ||||||||||||
Revolution and Rebellion | - Elliot is a revolutionary who wants to change the world. - He is part of fsociety, a group of hackers who are trying to take down Evil Corp. - He believes that violence is sometimes necessary to achieve change. | Revolution and rebellion are important themes in Mr. Robot. The series explores the different ways that people can fight against oppression and injustice. | ||||||||||||
Mental Illness | - Elliot suffers from mental illness, including depression and anxiety. - He takes medication and sees a therapist, but he struggles to control his symptoms. - His mental illness affects his relationships and his ability to function. | Mental illness is a serious issue that affects many people. Mr. Robot does not shy away from depicting the challenges that people with mental illness face. | ||||||||||||
Love and Loss | - Elliot has lost many people in his life, including his father and his sister. - He has difficulty forming close relationships. - He is drawn to people who are damaged and vulnerable. | Love and loss are powerful forces in human life. Mr. Robot explores the different ways that people deal with loss and how it can shape their lives. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a blend of introspective voiceover narration, dark and mysterious atmosphere, and a focus on themes of technology, power, and conspiracy. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of unease and mystery that draws the audience in and sets the stage for the unfolding narrative. |
Best Representation Scene | 1 - Elliot's Paranoid Awakening |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the author's voice because it establishes the tone, themes, and character of the series. |
- Overall originality score: 9
- Overall originality explanation: The screenplay displays high originality in its exploration of complex and introspective themes, unconventional storytelling techniques, and authentic character development. The incorporation of the unreliable narrator concept and merging of reality and delusion adds a unique layer to the narrative.
- Most unique situations: The most unique situations in the screenplay include Elliot's communication with an imaginary friend, the exploration of psychological turmoil through corporate espionage, the blurring of lines between hacker culture and personal relationships, and the portrayal of social and economic inequality through the cyber attacks.
- Overall unpredictability score: 8.5
- Overall unpredictability explanation: The screenplay maintains a high level of unpredictability throughout, keeping the audience engaged and guessing. The fragmented narrative, sudden plot twists, and ambiguous motivations of characters contribute to the overall sense of uncertainty and suspense.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals revolve around navigating his mental health, confronting illegal activities, maintaining a dual identity, managing relationships, and seeking justice and understanding. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals include protecting himself, exposing illegal activities, handling cybersecurity threats, maintaining professional reputation, and uncovering the truth behind a hack. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict revolves around power and control, morality of hacking and vigilantism, and the balance between personal relationships and professional obligations. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's evolving goals and internal conflicts shape his journey towards self-discovery, growth, and a deeper understanding of the world around him.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals drive the plot forward, creating tension, conflict, and resolution within the narrative structure of the screenplay.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The protagonist's goals and philosophical conflicts contribute to the exploration of themes such as power, morality, justice, identity, and the human connection, adding depth and complexity to the screenplay's narrative.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
- Physical environment: The screenplay presents a modern, urban environment, with scenes set in bustling city streets, high-rise office buildings, and seedy establishments, reflecting the complex and multifaceted nature of the world portrayed.
- Culture: The screenplay explores themes of conspiracy, wealth, power, and disillusionment, with the presence of secret groups controlling the world and characters questioning societal values and heroes. It reflects a culture of distrust and paranoia, as well as a yearning for rebellion and change.
- Society: The societal structure depicted is one of inequality, with a wealthy elite holding immense power and influence while the masses struggle with debt, alienation, and a lack of control over their lives. The screenplay highlights the tensions between the privileged and the marginalized, as well as the ways in which technology and power dynamics shape societal interactions.
- Technology: Technology plays a pivotal role in the screenplay, with hacking and cybersecurity serving as central themes. The characters navigate a world where digital information and networks are constantly under threat, and the line between the real and the virtual becomes increasingly blurred. Technology empowers characters to disrupt the established order but also raises ethical questions about surveillance, privacy, and control.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, society, and technology of the screenplay shape the characters' experiences and actions in profound ways. The urban landscape provides a backdrop for their struggles and ambitions, while the pervasive atmosphere of conspiracy and distrust influences their decision-making and interactions. The societal inequalities and power dynamics create tensions and conflicts that drive the characters' actions, and the technological advancements both empower and challenge them.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative of the screenplay by providing a rich and immersive setting for the characters and their conflicts. The physical environment, culture, society, and technology are not merely backdrops but active forces that drive the plot and shape the characters' journeys. The exploration of conspiracy, wealth, power, and technology creates a sense of urgency and suspense, as the characters navigate a world where nothing is as it seems.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring the complex relationship between power, control, and freedom. The themes of conspiracy and wealth highlight the ways in which hidden agendas and socioeconomic disparities can shape individual lives and societal structures. The exploration of technology raises questions about the nature of reality, the ethics of surveillance, and the potential for both liberation and oppression in a digital age. Ultimately, the screenplay delves into the human desire for connection, control, and the search for meaning in a world that is both fascinating and deeply flawed.
central conflict
Elliot's struggle with mental illness and his attempts to uncover the truth about a shadowy group that he believes is controlling the world.
primary motivations
- Elliot's desire to find out the truth about the shadowy group.
- Elliot's desire to help those who have been wronged by the shadowy group.
- Elliot's desire to protect himself from the shadowy group.
catalysts
- Elliot's meeting with Mr. Robot.
- Elliot's discovery of the Evil Corp hack.
- Elliot's arrest by the Men in Black.
barriers
- Elliot's mental illness.
- The shadowy group's power and influence.
- Elliot's own self-destructive tendencies.
themes
- The power of technology.
- The dangers of living in a surveillance state.
- The importance of mental health.
stakes
The fate of the world.
uniqueness factor
The show's unique visual style and storytelling techniques.
audience hook
The show's fast-paced plot and suspenseful atmosphere.
paradoxical engine or bisociation
The show's exploration of the paradoxical nature of reality.
paradoxical engine or bisociation 2
The show's use of bisociation, or the linking of two seemingly unrelated ideas, to create new insights.
Engine: GPT4
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay of 'Mr. Robot' is a compelling narrative that effectively combines elements of psychological drama and thriller with a strong focus on cybersecurity. The character development, particularly of Elliot, is well-executed, with a deep dive into his psychological state. The plot is engaging with several twists that maintain suspense. However, improvements could be made in pacing and clarity of some technical aspects.
- The scene where Elliot decides to swap the envelopes, choosing to frame Colby, showcases a pivotal moment of character development and plot progression. high ( Scene 14 )
- The introduction of the character Elliot and the mysterious Mr. Robot are intriguing and effectively set up the psychological and mysterious tone of the screenplay. high ( Scene 1 Scene 11 )
- The screenplay effectively uses voice-over narration to provide insight into Elliot's thoughts and motivations, enhancing the psychological depth of the character. medium
- The final scenes build suspense and intrigue, leaving the audience eager for more, effectively setting up for subsequent episodes or sequels. high ( Scene 16 )
- The dialogue is sharp and realistic, contributing to strong character development and maintaining a gripping narrative pace. medium
- Some scenes may benefit from a clearer connection to the main narrative to avoid confusion, particularly in the subplot involving Krista and Michael. medium
- The pacing in the middle sections could be tightened to maintain momentum and keep the audience engaged throughout. medium ( Scene 5 Scene 6 )
- The screenplay could explore more diverse backgrounds and motivations for the supporting characters to enhance depth and relatability. low
- Increase clarity around the technical aspects of hacking to ensure they are accessible and understandable to viewers without background knowledge. medium
- Some of the transitions between scenes are abrupt and could be smoothed to improve narrative flow. low
- There is a need for more explicit connections between Elliot's actions and the broader implications on the society, to enhance the thematic depth. medium
- The screenplay's portrayal of mental health through the protagonist provides a nuanced and compelling exploration of the subject. high
- The use of technology and cybersecurity as central themes is timely and relevant, appealing to contemporary audiences interested in these topics. high
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Mr. Robot' is a compelling and tightly-plotted narrative that follows the journey of Elliot, a socially-isolated cyber security engineer with a dark past. The story skillfully blends techno-thriller elements with psychological drama, exploring Elliot's complex relationship with technology, society, and his own demons. The screenplay features strong character development, particularly in Elliot's interactions with Mr. Robot and his close friend Angela, and showcases a strong grasp of hacking and cybersecurity concepts. While there are a few areas that could be further developed, such as the background of the fsociety group and Elliot's personal history, the screenplay overall demonstrates a high level of technical expertise and narrative sophistication. The unique premise, compelling protagonist, and timely themes make this screenplay a strong candidate for production and potential commercial success.
- The confrontation scene between Elliot and Phil is a standout, showcasing Elliot's technical prowess and manipulation skills, as well as highlighting his emotionally damaged backstory. high ( Scene 2 (INT. PHIL'S COFFEE (FLASHBACK) - NIGHT) )
- The Ferris wheel sequence is a powerful character moment that delves into Elliot's psyche and reveals his motivation for potentially joining Mr. Robot's plan, tying it to his past trauma with Evil Corp. high ( Scene 13 (EXT. CONEY ISLAND - FERRIS WHEEL - DAY) )
- The therapy scenes provide valuable insight into Elliot's mental state and his strained relationships, adding depth to his character arc. medium ( Scene 5 (INT. PSYCHOLOGIST'S OFFICE - DAY) )
- The scene in Angela's apartment showcases the strong bond between the two friends and sets up potential future conflict as Elliot's actions have unintended consequences. medium ( Scene 16 (INT. ANGELA'S APARTMENT) )
- Elliot's hacking into Michael's accounts and the subsequent blackmail sequence demonstrates his technical abilities and moral grey areas, adding complexity to his character. medium ( Scene 14 (INT. ELLIOT'S LOFT - NIGHT) )
- The introduction of the fsociety group and their mission could be fleshed out more to better establish their motivations and provide a clearer sense of their overall plan. medium ( Scene 11 (INT. FSOCIETY ARCADE - CONTINUOUS) )
- The conversation between Gideon and Elliot in the private jet could be expanded upon to further develop their relationship and Gideon's internal struggles, which are only briefly touched upon. medium ( Scene 10 (INT. PRIVATE JET (MOVING) - DAWN) )
- The brief scene with Tyrell Wellick could be expanded to provide more insight into his character and his potential motivations, as he seems to be an important figure in the larger narrative. medium ( Scene 9 (INT. TYRELL WELLICK'S SUBURBAN HOME - NIGHT) )
- The screenplay would benefit from more background information on the fsociety group and their past activities, as well as a clearer explanation of their overall plan and how Elliot fits into it. medium ( Scene 12 (EXT. CONEY ISLAND STREETS - LATER) )
- The screenplay could delve deeper into Elliot's past and his relationship with his father, as this appears to be a significant factor in his current mental state and motivations. medium ( Scene 7 (INT. ELLIOT'S LOFT - NIGHT) )
- The sequence depicting Elliot and the team's efforts to resolve the Evil Corp hack is a high-tension, technically-driven set piece that showcases the screenplay's attention to detail and Elliot's hacking expertise. high ( Scene 8 (INT. ALLSAFE OFFICES - NIGHT) )
- The revelation of Terry Colby's arrest at the end of the sequence is a compelling twist that sets up further developments in the overarching narrative and Elliot's potential involvement. high ( Scene 16 (INT. ANGELA'S APARTMENT) )
- The subtle shift in Elliot's mindset and emotional state as he witnesses the impact of the Evil Corp scandal is a well-executed character moment that sets the stage for his potential transformation. medium ( Scene 15 (INT. NYC SUBWAY (MOVING) - DAY) )
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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16 | Elliot: It's happening. It's happening. It's happening. It's happening. |
5 | Elliot: Fuck society. |
7 | Elliot: The key to doing morphine without turning into a junkie is to limit yourself to 30mg a day. |
10 | Mr. Robot: My dad was a petty thief. Never could hold down a job. So, he just robbed, convenience stores, shops, small-time stuff. |
6 | Elliot: Sometimes I dream of saving everyone from the invisible hand. |