Mulholland Drive
Executive Summary
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Overview
Genres: Mystery, Thriller, Drama, Crime
Setting: Contemporary, Hollywood, Los Angeles
Overview: A young actress, Betty Elms, arrives in Hollywood to pursue her dreams, but soon finds herself drawn into a strange and unsettling world. After a car accident, she meets Rita, a mysterious woman with amnesia. Together, they embark on a journey to uncover Rita's past and the secrets that connect them to the dark underbelly of Hollywood.
Themes: Identity and Memory, Dreams and Reality, Hollywood and the Entertainment Industry, Mystery and Intrigue, Power and Control
Conflict and Stakes: Betty and Rita's search for Rita's identity and the dangerous secrets they uncover along the way, which involve a web of crime and deception within the entertainment industry.
Overall Mood: A mix of mystery, suspense, and surrealism, creating a sense of unease and intrigue throughout the story.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: A sense of anticipation and excitement as Betty arrives in Hollywood, filled with dreams and aspirations.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The exploration of the dark and alluring underbelly of Hollywood, revealing the secrets and dangers that lie beneath the glamorous façade.
- Major Twist: Rita's true identity and the shocking revelation of her involvement in a sinister conspiracy.
- Distinctive Setting: The iconic and evocative backdrop of Hollywood, capturing the glamour, excess, and hidden darkness of the entertainment industry.
Comparable Scripts:
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a blend of writing styles, often shifting between mystery, suspense, and humor. It incorporates elements of psychological thrillers, crime dramas, and romantic comedies.
Style Similarities:
- David Lynch
- Quentin Tarantino
- Nora Ephron
Pass/Consider/Recommend
Recommend
Explanation: The screenplay for 'Mulholland Drive' is highly recommended. It effectively establishes the mysterious and dangerous atmosphere of the film, introduces the protagonist and her vulnerability, and sets up the central conflict that drives the narrative. The screenplay features strong and impactful visuals, creating a sense of tension and suspense that keeps the audience engaged. However, there are areas that could be improved, such as providing more context about the backstory and motivations of the characters, and enhancing character development through more nuanced dialogue. Additionally, there are missing elements, such as the need for clearer explanations of certain backstories and stakes, and unanswered questions in some scenes. Overall, the screenplay showcases notable strengths in its tone, performances, cinematography, and foreshadowing of themes. It is a compelling and engaging narrative that would captivate audiences.
USP: This psychological thriller script presents a unique blend of dark, dreamlike atmosphere, and exploration of the human Psyche not often seen in the genre. With its enigmatic and mysterious tone, the script draws viewers into a world of uncertainty and intrigue, challenging their perceptions of reality. Through the experiences of its distinctive characters, the script explores themes of identity, memory, and the nature of truth, leaving a lasting impact long after the final scene.
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$10-15 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-35, fans of psychological thrillers, neo-noir, and character-driven dramas.
Marketability: A gripping and suspenseful story with complex and intriguing characters, set against the iconic backdrop of Hollywood. It has the potential to attract a wide audience and generate buzz due to its unique blend of genres and exploration of dark and alluring themes.
While the screenplay has a strong premise and well-developed characters, the plot may be too complex for some mainstream audiences. The unique blend of genres and exploration of dark and alluring themes may also limit its appeal to a wider audience.
The screenplay has a solid foundation, but may need further development to enhance its marketability. The story's pacing and the balance between character development and plot progression could be improved to appeal to a broader audience.
Profit Potential: Moderate, due to its appeal to a niche audience and limited commercial potential.
Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by its dark, suspenseful, and dreamlike atmosphere, with a focus on psychological depth and the exploration of the human psyche.
Best representation: Scene 1 - Midnight Run. This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it perfectly encapsulates the dark, suspenseful, and dreamlike atmosphere that permeates the entire script. The vivid imagery and psychological depth of this scene draw the reader in and create a sense of intrigue and mystery that keeps them on the edge of their seat.
Memorable Lines:
- Betty: Before I kill you. (Scene 26)
- Betty: I don't know who I am. (Scene 11)
- Adam: That girl is not in my film!!! (Scene 10)
- Dark-Haired Woman: What are you doing? You don't stop here ... (Scene 1)
- Betty: Oh my! (Scene 6)
Characters
Betty Elms:A young, aspiring actress who arrives in Hollywood seeking fame and fortune.
Rita:A mysterious woman with amnesia who Betty takes under her wing.
Story Shape
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall Grade | Concept | Plot | Originality Score | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Tragic Crash on Mulholland Drive | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
2 - Midnight Run | Suspenseful, Panicked, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
3 - Apartment Infiltration and Unsettling Dreams | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
4 - Sudden Death | Suspenseful, Intense, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 3 | 8 | 7 | 0 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | |
5 - Arriving at the Courtyard Apartment | Mysterious, Dreamlike, Nostalgic | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
6 - Unexpected Encounter in the New Apartment | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
7 - An Unexpected Guest | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 5 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
8 - Violent Confrontation in Downtown LA Office | Suspenseful, Dark, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
9 - Casting Concerns | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
10 - The Conference Room Showdown | Suspenseful, Intense, Confrontational | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
11 - Mysteries Unravel | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
12 - The Call | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
13 - Mystery and Amnesia | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
14 - Call the Police | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Curious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
15 - Unexpected Discovery | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
16 - Paint and Fury | Tense, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
17 - Rita and Betty Leave Aunt Ruth's House | Curiosity, Excitement, Hope | 9 | 8 | 8 | 4 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
18 - An Unexplained Accident | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
19 - Waitress Under Suspicion | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
20 - The Search for Diane Selwyn | Mysterious, Tense, Confused, Curious | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
21 - Unwelcome Visitor | Suspenseful, Intense, Dramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
22 - Unveiling Mysterious Visitors | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Tense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
23 - Financial Quandary | Confusion, Anger, Suspense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 4 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
24 - Adam's Financial Crisis | Suspenseful, Tense, Mysterious | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
25 - The Cowboy's Advice | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
26 - Sisterly Conflict: Rita and | Tense, Suspenseful, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
27 - An Awkward Visitor | Tense, Suspenseful, Melodramatic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
28 - Aunt's Suspicions | Tense, Suspenseful, Melodramatic | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
29 - Detectives Investigate Phony Credit Cards | Tense, Suspenseful, Melodramatic | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
30 - Betty Inquires About The Deal's Facilitator | Tense, Suspenseful, Melodramatic, Mysterious | 9 | 8 | 9 | 3 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 3 | 7 | 8 | 4 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
31 - Betty Arrives at Paramount Studios | Suspenseful, Melodramatic, Intense | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
32 - The Audition | Tense, Suspenseful, Melodramatic | 9 | 8 | 8 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
33 - Dispute in the Corridor | Tense, Melodramatic, Suspenseful | 8 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | |
34 - Casting Call | Suspenseful, Melodramatic, Hopeful | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
35 - A Chance Encounter | Suspenseful, Melodramatic, Mysterious | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
36 - Suspicious Encounter | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious, Dramatic | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
37 - Seeking Diane at Sierra Bonita | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious, Melodramatic | 8 | 7 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | |
38 - Deadly Discovery | Suspenseful, Dark, Disturbing | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
39 - Betty Calms Rita | Horror, Suspense, Drama | 9 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
40 - An Uncanny Reflection | Eerie, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | |
41 - A Helping Hand | Suspenseful, Intense, Emotional | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 4 | 9 | 9 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | |
42 - Betty and Rita Arrive in Hollywood | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Intense | 9 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 5 | 10 | 9 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 |
Scene 1 - Tragic Crash on Mulholland Drive
Darkness. Distant sounds of freeway traffic. Then the closer
sound of a car - its headlights illumine an oleander bush and
the limbs of an Eucalyptus tree. Then the headlights turn - a
street sign is suddenly brightly lit. The words on the sign
read... "Mulholland Drive." The car moves under the sign as
it turns and the words fall once again into darkness.
CUT TO:
EXT. NIGHT - MULHOLLAND DRIVE
Gliding we follow the car - an older black Cadillac limousine
- as it winds its way up Mulholland Drive through the
darkness of the Hollywood Hills. There is no one else on the
road. As we drift closer to the car...
CUT TO:
INT. BLACK CADILLAC LIMOUSINE - NIGHT
Two men in dark suits are sitting in the front seat. A
beautiful, younger, dark-haired woman sits in back. She sits
close up against the door and stares out into the darkness.
She seems to be thinking about something. Suddenly she turns
and looks ahead. The car is slowing and moving off to the
side of the road.
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
What are you doing? You don't stop
here ...
The car stops - half on, half off the road at a dark, blind
curve. Both men turn to the woman.
DRIVER
Get out of the car.
CUT TO:
EXT. FURTHER UP MULHOLLAND DRIVE - NIGHT
Two cars - a convertible and a late model sedan are drag
racing toward the blind curve blocking the view of the
Cadillac limousine. The cars are filled with crazed
teenagers. Two girls are standing up through the sunroof of
the sedan screaming as their hair is whipped straight back.
The cars are travelling so fast that they seem to almost
float as they fly with psychotic speed down both lanes of
Mulholland Drive.
CUT TO:
INT. EXT. - CADILLAC LIMOUSINE
The driver, still in his seat, has a pistol with a silencer
attached pointing at the woman. The other man is getting out
of the car. The woman is clutching the seat and the door
handle as if trying to anchor herself. She is visibly afraid.
The man who got out of the car tries the woman's door, but it
is locked. He smiles as he reaches in through the front door
and unlocks her door. He opens her door. As he reaches for
her, the woman's face becomes flooded with light. Her eyes
dart to the front windshield. The driver, flooded with light,
turns just as the late model sedan slams into the Cadillac
limousine. There is an explosion of metal and glass amidst
thunderous tearing sounds as the two cars become one in
death. The convertible screams past with hardly a notice.
The driver of the limousine dies instantly as his body is
jettisoned through the windshield. The other man is torn as
the cars screech over him. The woman is brutally thrown into
the back of the front seats as a cloud of dust and flying
rocks engulfs her. The disastrous moving sculpture of the two
cars wants to climb up the hill, then stops and slides back
toward the road The Cadillac tips onto its side. Then all is
silent. A fire erupts in the sedan and as the dust clears we
see the woman appear, then crawl out of the Cadillac to the
road. Her face is vacant. There is a bleeding cut just above
her forehead. She stands for a moment clutching her purse -
lost , then begins to walk as if in a trance across
Mulholland down through the bushes and into darkness.
DISSOLVE TO:
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Scene 2 - Midnight Run
The woman slides down a hill through tangles of hostile
desert plants. Sirens can be heard in the distance. She
crosses through some trees and is suddenly confronted by a
coyote which snarls and leaps at her. She screams and strikes
out with her purse in self defense. The coyote backs away -
snarling. The woman then loses control and runs at the coyote
and it races off. She falls to the ground. We can hear the
thunder of her heartbeat as the sirens grow louder. She gets
up and stumbles through the trees. When she clears them she
is standing overlooking all of Los Angeles glowing down
below. She clumsily starts down toward it.
DISSOLVE TO:
HOLLYWOOD STREETS - LATER - NIGHT
The woman slides down a dusty hill and finds herself at
Franklin Avenue. A car races by and its headlights flare on
her face. Her expression shows fear and panic. She doesn't
know where she is or where to go. She runs frantically across
the street. She moves quickly to a sidewalk which takes her
into a residential area.
DISSOLVE TO:
EXT. HOLLYWOOD STREETS - LATER - NIGHT
The woman crosses Sunset Boulevard. Coming up Sunset in the
distance is a police car with its sirens and lights going.
She hurries into the darkness of another residential area. A
car turns onto the street and comes toward her. She
instinctively moves behind a tree until it passes.
DISSOLVE TO:
EXT. HOLLYWOOD STREETS - LATER - NIGHT
As if being hunted in a foreign land the woman moves
desperately down another residential street. A drunken couple
round the corner up ahead and start up the sidewalk toward
her. She runs off the sidewalk and into the bushes in front
of an apartment building. The couple passes by without
noticing her. Feeling safe in these bushes her exhaustion
overtakes her and she lays her head down to sleep.
DISSOLVE TO:
EXT. MULHOLLAND DRIVE - NIGHT
Police, paramedics surround the wreckage. Two detectives,
HARRY MCKNIGHT and NEAL DOMGAARD (both mid 40's to 50), stare
at the remains of the two cars glowing white hot under the
crime scene lights. A coroner's van pulls out just after an
ambulance. The ambulance's siren begins to wail as it speeds
off. The coroner's van cruises slowly. Detective Harry
McKnight and Detective Neal Domgaard continue staring. They
do not look at each other. They are each motionless for a
long moment.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
You feel it?
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Yeah.
They continue to stare.
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Sammy thinks the Caddy had stopped along
the shoulder ... man up the road said he
saw two cars drag racin'...then you got
that blind corner.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Two men... two guns in the Caddy.
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
The boys found this on the floor in back
of the Caddy.
Neal holds up a plastic bag holding a pearl earring.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Yeah, they showed me
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Could be unrelated.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Could be...any of those dead kids wearin'
pearl earrings?
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
No. Could be someone's missin' maybe.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
That's what I'm thinkin'.
Detective Harry McKnight turns and crosses Mulholland. His
eyes move over each blade of grass at the shoulder - each
desert bush just beyond. He slowly raises his gaze to the
shining lights of Hollywood laying far below like a galaxy.
He looks out and wonders.
CUT TO:
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Scene 3 - Apartment Infiltration and Unsettling Dreams
The clang of a metal gate wakes the woman. It is just getting
light and she sees an older red-headed woman carrying a
suitcase to the curb where a cab stands waiting with its
trunk open. The cab driver appears with two suitcases which
he sets down next to the car. The red-headed woman and the
cab driver both go back through the iron gate. The woman in
the bushes pulls herself to the gate where she can peer into
the courtyard of this apartment building. She sees the red-
headed woman and the cab driver go into an apartment and come
back out with more luggage.
They leave the apartment door open. When the red-headed woman
and the cab driver reach the cab they both begin loading the
bags into the trunk and backseat. Their backs are to the
woman in the bushes who takes this opportunity to go quickly
into the courtyard and through the open apartment door.
CUT TO:
INT. APARTMENT - EARLY DAWN
The woman comes into a living room where a single trunk
remains. She goes further into the apartment and crouches
down in a back corner of the kitchen. She listens as
footsteps come across the courtyard. She hears the red-headed
woman and the cab driver get the trunk. She hears them set it
down once they have it in the courtyard. She hears the steps
of the red-headed woman come back inside the apartment. She
hears the footsteps go all around the apartment and then she
hears the footsteps come toward the kitchen. Remaining
frozen, the dark-haired woman's eyes look up as the red-
headed woman walks right past her, grabs a set of keys off
the kitchen counter, then leaves the apartment. The woman can
hear the door being locked. She lets go, slides to the
kitchen floor, and passes out.
CUT TO:
INT. DENNY'S RESTAURANT , HOLLYWOOD - MORNING
Two well-dressed men HERB and DAN (mid 30's) are sitting at a
table drinking coffee. Herb has finished eating his
breakfast, but Dan hasn't touched his bacon and eggs - he
appears too nervous to eat. A blonde waitress with a
nameplate saying "DIANE" lays the check on their table
smiles, then walks off.
HERB
Why did you want to go to breakfast if
you're not hungry?
DAN
I just wanted to come here.
HERB
To Denny's? I wasn't going to say
anything, but why Denny's?
DAN
This Denny's.
HERB
Okay. Why this Denny's?
DAN
It's kind of embarrassing but,
HERB
Go ahead.
DAN
I had a dream about this place.
HERB
Oh boy.
DAN
You see what I mean...
HERB
Okay, so you had a dream about this
place. Tell me.
DAN
Well ... it's the second one I've had, but
they were both the same......they start
out that I'm in here but it's not day or
night. It's kinda half night, but it
looks just like this except for the
light, but I'm scared like I can't tell
ya. Of all people you're standing right
over there by that counter. You're in
both dreams and you're scared. I get
even more frightened when I see how
afraid you are and then I realize what it
is - there's a man...in back of this
place. He's the one ... he's the one
that's doing it. I can see him through
the wall. I can see his face and I hope
I never see that face ever outside a
dream.
Herb stares at Dan to see if he will continue. Dan looks
around nervously, then stares at his uneaten food.
DAN (cont'd)
That's it.
HERB
So, you came to see if he's out there?
DAN
To get rid of this god-awful feeling.
HERB
Right then.
Herb gets up, picks up the bill and goes to the cashier to
pay. Dan just sits.
As Herb is paying the bill he looks over at Dan just as Dan
is turning to look at him. From Dan's point of view Herb is
standing in exactly the same spot as he stood in the dream.
Herb gets a strange feeling, turns back and finishes up with
the cashier. He motions for Dan to follow him. Dan rises
reluctantly and he and Herb make their way outside.
CUT TO:
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Scene 4 - Sudden Death
Now Herb waits for Dan to lead the way.
DAN
Around here.
Dan takes Herb across the front of Denny's to a narrow
sidewalk that leads down the side toward the back.
They begin walking down the narrow sidewalk - past a
payphone. Dan begins to sweat the nearer he gets to the rear
corner of the building. Red bricks glide by slowly.
CLOSER ON DAN
Beads of sweat cover his face. He finds it difficult to
breathe. Herb is just behind him unable to see the fear
overtaking his friend, but Herb can feel something himself.
The red bricks moving by now are coming to an end - the
corner is coming closer - the corner is now very close.
Suddenly a man - a face ... a face dark and bum-like- moves
quickly out from behind the corner and stops - freezes -
staring into Dan's eyes.
Dan lurches back. All his breath is suddenly gone. He falls
back into Herb who tries to catch him as he's falling. Dan
hits the ground unable to breathe - his eyes wide with
horror.
Herb looks up - the man is gone. He looks down to Dan.
HERB
Dan! ... Dan! You all right? ... Dan!
He kneels down and studies his friend. He feels for a pulse
in the neck. He listens for breathing. His friend is dead.
HERB (cont'd)
My God!
DISSOLVE TO:
EXT. LAX AIRPORT - DAY
The airport sits in blinding sunlight and veiled with smog.
A big jet lands.
CUT TO:
INT. LAX AIRPORT
A blonde girl walking with an old woman approaches us. As the
blonde's face fills the screen we move with her and stay with
her as she goes. Her face is bright and her eyes move here
and there taking in everything. She can hardly believe she's
in Los Angeles - the City of Dreams. She and the old woman
pass under a sign which reads "WELCOME TO LOS ANGELES."
The girl smiles and looks around excited by every detail.
CUT TO:
EXT. LAX AIRPORT
The girl and the old lady exit the terminal with their bags.
An older gentleman has joined the old lady. They stop at the
taxicab stand. The old lady takes the blonde girl's hand.
OLD LADY
It's time to say goodbye, Betty. It's
been so nice travelling with you.
BETTY
Thank you, Irene. I was so excited and
nervous. It was sure great to have you
to talk to.
IRENE
Now, remember I'll be watching for you on
the big screen.
BETTY
(smiling)
Okay Irene. Won't that be the day.
IRENE
The best of luck to you, Betty. Take
care of yourself and be careful.
BETTY
Okay I will. Thanks again.
Betty and Irene give each other a hug. The old gentleman nods
to Betty and takes Irene off. Betty smiles after them.
Suddenly someone is grabbing her bags. She turns abruptly to
find she is next in line and her cab is waiting. She turns
once more and waves at Irene as her bags are loaded into the
trunk of the cab.
CAB DRIVER
Where to?
BETTY
(smiling excitedly)
1612 Havenhurst.
CAB DRIVER
Got it!
They get into the cab and close their doors. The cab pulls
away.
CUT TO:
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Scene 5 - Arriving at the Courtyard Apartment
Betty goes from the right side of the cab to the left side of
the cab looking at every building, tree and sign. Each street
sign seems to be magical to her and she says the names to
herself as they pass by. She sees La Tijera, La Cienega,
Venice Boulevard, Pico Boulevard, Olympic Boulevard, Wilshire
Boulevard, etc., etc. until they reach Fountain and turn
right. Betty's heart is pounding when she sees Havenhurst
and the cab turns left. In the middle of the block on the
right the cab pulls over and stops. Betty sees her new
home ... an ancient, gorgeous courtyard apartment building,
built during the golden age of cinema.
CUT TO:
EXT. 1612 HAVENHURST
The cab driver puts Betty's bags down on the sidewalk next to
her. She can barely stop looking at the building long enough
to pay the cab driver who then goes off and drives away.
Betty picks up her bags and enters, as if in a dream, through
an ornate iron gate to a courtyard with a beautiful working
fountain at its center. A sign on a door to her right reads
Manager and she rings the bell.
An older, once very beautiful, woman wearing heavy make-up
and smoking a cigarette in a silver holder opens the door.
An unbelievable raspy voice comes out through the dark screen
of the still closed screen door.
MANAGER
Hi there...ten bucks says you're Betty.
BETTY
I am, Mrs. Lanois. It is Mrs. Lanois
isn't it?
MRS. LANOIS
In all my living glory, baby.
BETTY
Pleased to meet you.
MRS. LANOIS
You can call me Coco ... everybody does.
Stay there, I'll get the key.
BETTY
Okay, Coco.
Coco returns with the key and opens the screen door inhaling
a huge drag off her cigarette. She starts off into the
courtyard and Betty picks up her bags and follows. As Coco
speaks smoke comes out of her with every word.
COCO
I guess it was your grandfather, was
it ... he called me to check in, said you
were on your way and for you to call when
you get in. Nice man... farmer I hear.
BETTY
Yes, he is. He raises corn.
COCO
Damn lot of corn raised in Hollywood
these days too.
BETTY
Well, I ...
COCO
You don't have to tell me. It's written
all over that pretty face of yours.. You
came here to be an actress. I just hope
you'll remember there's never been a
great poem called "tits and ass."
BETTY
I...
COCO
You probably don't remember her, but
Louise Bonner lives right over there in
number 29. When she isn't drunk she runs
a damn good acting class.
BETTY
Have many famous actors and actresses
lived here? I was meaning to ask you
that.
COCO
Honey, all the great ones came through
here at one time or another.
A haunting music begins to swell.
COCO (cont'd)
People say in the springtime when the
wind blows the smell of the jasmine you
can still feel the presence of everyone
of them.
BETTY
I guess I've come to quite a place.
COCO
Sweetheart, you don't know the half of
it.
The music fades.
Coco looks down suddenly. On the cobblestone courtyard in
front of her she sees a fresh product of waste from a dog.
She angrily turns up to an apartment on the second level.
COCO (cont'd)
(yelling up)
WILKINS! ... (no answer) ... THAT DOG CRAPS
ONCE MORE OUT HERE AND I'LL BAKE HIS
BUTT FOR BREAKFAST!!
Coco turns back to Betty.
COCO (cont'd)
You don't have pets do you?
BETTY
No, I don't.
COCO
That's good. They're allowed, but I
don't like 'em...for obvious reasons.
One man used to live here that had a
prize fighting kangaroo. You wouldn't
believe what that kangaroo did to this
courtyard ... let's see your Aunt's
apartment ... it's a good one.
BETTY
I can hardly wait, Coco.
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Scene 6 - Unexpected Encounter in the New Apartment
The dirty and torn black cocktail dress of the dark-haired
woman along with her shoes, purse and undergarments are in a
pile in the bedroom. We drift off them toward the bathroom
where the dark-haired woman can be seen showering through
rippled glass. There's the sound of a door opening. We see a
movement through the glass and the shower goes off instantly.
We can hear the dark-haired woman's frightened breathing as
she waits frozen listening.
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INT. APARTMENT LIVING ROOM
Betty enters, thrilled with what she sees. The apartment is
filled with movie memorabilia, deco furniture, oriental rugs,
brass floor lamps and a massive tiled fireplace. She sets her
bags down and stares.
BETTY
It's unbelievable!
COCO
I told ya.
BETTY
Wow!
COCO
Now I guess you and your Aunt have an
understanding. So here's the key and you
need anything, just give a holler.
(Coco hands Betty the key)
Everybody in this building's pretty much
okay with me or they wouldn't be here.
If you want, later I'll introduce you
around. No hard feelings if you don't,
and don't forget the rooftop garden.
It's just up the stairs we passed. It's
open to all the tenants. You can see the
Hollywood sign from there.
BETTY
Oh Coco thank you. Thank you so much.
COCO
You got it! See you later honey.
Coco leaves and closes the door behind her. Betty begins to
explore the apartment.- After walking a circle in the living
room she passes through the kitchen. She moves down a
hallway looking at paintings and posters. She goes into the
bedroom. She smiles when she sees the bed which has a huge
ornately carved head and foot board. She notices the soiled
dress on the floor and she frowns as she looks closer. She
stands back up, shrugs and goes into the bathroom which has
all the original thirties fixtures damndest floor to ceiling
tiles. As she goes toward the sink she smiles to herself in
the mirror above it. Suddenly something catches her eye and
she opens the shower stall. There before her is the naked,
beautiful dark-haired woman.
BETTY
Oh my!
She quickly closes the shower door.
BETTY (cont'd)
I'm sorry. My Aunt ... Ruth didn't tell
me someone was going to be here. I'm so
sorry.
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
That's okay.
BETTY
I'm Ruth's niece. My name's Betty. I'm
sure she told you I was coming.
There's a silence.
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
There was an accident. I came here.
BETTY
I understand. I saw the dress. I...I'm
sorry. Are you all right?
There is another silence.
BETTY (cont'd)
What happened?
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
A car ... a car accident.
BETTY
Are you okay?
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
I think so. I was just taking a shower.
BETTY
Oh my god. I'm sorry. I'll let you get
back to that. I'm going to get unpacked.
Betty goes to the bathroom door and is closing it when she
stops and looks back in.
BETTY (cont'd)
What's your name?
We see a close-up of the dark-haired woman. We see her eyes
widen with a kind of fear. She's frantically thinking -
searching her mind for an answer.
BETTY (cont'd)
I'm sorry. I'll get out of here and we
can talk later.
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Scene 7 - An Unexpected Guest
Betty is unpacking in the bedroom and putting her belongings
in the closet and the dresser drawers. Many of her Aunt's
things are still there.
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INT. APARTMENT BATHROOM
The dark-haired woman is looking at herself in the mirror.
She turns and begins looking around the bathroom at shampoos,
cosmetics, until her eyes fall on a poster of "Gilda"
starring Rita Hayworth.
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INT. APARTMENT BEDROOM
The bathroom door opens and the dark-haired woman comes out
wrapped in a towel. She's drying her hair with another. She
and Betty stare at one another.
DARK-HAIRED WOMAN
My name is Rita.
BETTY
Hi...do you work with my Aunt?
RITA
No ..........I.
BETTY
I...I mean......I...it's none of my
business.
RITA
She has pretty red hair... she is very
kind I think.
BETTY
She sure is. She's letting me stay here
while she's working on a movie that's
being made in Canada, but I guess you
know that. I couldn't afford a place
like this in a million years. Unless of
course I'm discovered and become a movie
star. Of course, I'd rather be known as
a great actress than a movie star, but
sometimes people end up being both and
that is, I guess you'd say, sort of why I
came here. I'm sorry, I'm just so
excited to be here..I mean I just came
here from Iowa and now I'm in this dream
place. You can imagine how I feel.
RITA
I think I've been hurt.
BETTY
Oh...
Betty goes to Rita.
BETTY (cont'd)
Sit down...
Betty sits Rita on the bed. She leans down and looks at her
head and face.
BETTY (cont'd)
Where were you hurt?
Rita motions to her head above her forehead. Betty looks
through her hair and finds her wound which has stopped
bleeding but is surrounded by a very large blue black
bruising.
BETTY (cont'd)
We should get a doctor.
RITA
No.
BETTY
But, this could be serious.
RITA
No...I need to sleep.
BETTY
If you have a concussion you shouldn't
sleep.
RITA
It will be okay if I sleep. I need to
lie down and sleep.
BETTY
All right, but...I'm going to check on
you.
Rita lies down and is instantly asleep. Betty leans over her
and listens to her breathing. She gets a blanket and drapes
it over the beautiful sleeping Rita, then leaves the room.
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Scene 8 - Violent Confrontation in Downtown LA Office
The street level of the office building is filthy and houses
stores selling racks of cheap toys. Up above we see office
windows and a big sign saying "Office Space For Rent" along
with a telephone number to call. We drift in toward one of
the windows on the sixth floor.
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INT. OFFICE ON SIXTH FLOOR
Two men are in the room, JOE and ED. Joe leans up against a
rack of filing cabinets. He is in his late twenties. He
looks like a run down, heavy metal rocker - wears a blue
denim shirt open, T-shirt underneath, black denim jeans and
motorcycle boots. His black belt has silver studs. He's
smoking a cigarette and is laughing at something the man at
the desk has said. His laugh is easy and his grin is
infectious.
The man at the desk, Ed, wears a clean, crisp black suit,
like a business man's but unlike a business man his blonde
hair is long enough to go over his shoulders.
JOE
So man, that's unheard of ... an accident
like that ... who coulda foreseen that.
ED
Unreal ... so, you're looking good.
Whatcha doin' these days?
JOE
Well, not much Ed. Just doin' some stuff
for this guy.
ED
Making ends meet, huh.
JOE
Hardly.
ED
Yeah, look at my digs ... times are tough.
JOE
Oh, things aren't so bad. Gee, I hope
you're not goin' to get in any trouble.
ED
It was just a thing. The story made you
laugh.
JOE
Yeah, that's a funny story.
Looking like he's rubbing the small of his back Joe moves
over to Ed at his desk. Joe looks down to the surface of the
desk - to a small worn black book.
JOE (cont'd)
So, there it is ... Ed's famous black book.
ED
Yeah, the history of the world in phone
numbers.
Joe's hand still at the small of his back moves into view
holding a silenced pistol and in one swift move reaches out
and fires a hole through Ed's temple - blowing Ed's brains
out across the desk, carpet and wall. Ed's head bangs down
on the desk, then is still save the leaking of blood from the
wounds. Joe flips his finished cigarette out the open window
behind Ed's desk, wipes the gun clean with a handkerchief and
places the cleaned gun in Ed's right hand. He places Ed's
right forefinger gently onto the trigger. As he puts the
finger on the trigger he presses a little too hard and the
gun goes off. The bullet shoots out and penetrates the cheap
wall at the far end of Ed's office. Joe hears a muffled
scream.
JOE (cont'd)
(disgusted with himself)
Oh...man!
With a sense of "just more stuff I got to do" Joe moves
slowly and begrudgingly out of Ed's office, checks the
corridor and goes toward the screaming which still persists.
He opens up the office door next to Ed's and finds a heavy
set woman screaming bloody murder as she is grabbing her
buttock and lower back. He sighs and walks over to her and
cups his hand tightly around her mouth to squelch the
screaming. Wide-eyed, she tries to fight him off and he
begins dragging her out of her office. Joe's foot catches on
a computer cable clumsily taped across the floor and he falls
backwards bringing the heavy woman down with a bone-crushing
blow on top of him. The woman begins beating his face with
her meaty fists. Joe snaps her head back, instantly stilling
her violent activity. He wrestles the stunned heavyweight
back to her feet and out her door. He pushes and pulls her
into Ed's office. Just before they enter, Joe notices a man
with a vacuum cleaner watching him from the far end of the
corridor. He stops and calls to the man.
JOE (cont'd)
Hey man. She's hurt bad. Get down here
and use the phone. Help me out. You
gotta call the hospital.
The man hesitates...not sure if this jives with what he's
seeing.
JOE (cont'd)
I mean it! Get down here quick! She's
hurt and I can't do everything myself,
man.
Joe pushes the woman inside Ed's office, throws a glance back
down the corridor and sees the man is on his way to him,
pushing his industrial vacuum and trailing a 200 ft. long
thick black cord as he goes. Joe goes in to Ed's office
with the woman. He throws her down on the floor in line
between Ed's desk and the bullet hole in the wall. She
starts screaming immediately and struggles to get up. Joe
grabs the pistol from Ed's dead hand and lifts it to fire,
but the woman has turned around and is almost standing.
JOE (cont'd)
No, no, no. You gotta be turned around.
He goes to her, slaps her hard in the face and spins her
around. Before she can turn again Joe races back to place
himself in the proper line at Ed's desk and quickly fires two
silenced shots into the back of her head. The man with the
vacuum enters. His eyes begin to widen in reaction to the
scene. Just then Joe fires a bullet into the man's chest.
The man inadvertently flicks on the vacuum cleaner as his
hands rush up to the wound. As the vacuum cleaner whines Joe
rushes to the man before the man falls back out into the
corridor. He pulls him into the room - the man moaning and
clutching his chest, starting to collapse. Joe releases him
and the man goes down. The vacuum cleaner seems to be
screeching now in the threshold. Joe fires the last bullet
into the heavy duty vacuum cleaner. The bullet shorts out
the internal wiring of the vacuum. That in turn blows the
building's circuit breaker and all the lights go out.
JOE (cont'd)
(disgusted with himself)
Oh ... man!
Now he hears voices - voices moving into the corridor.
VOICES
What the hell .... what happened? What's
this cord doing here? It's the vacuum.
It's the vacuum what did it.
Joe cleans the pistol once again and places it back in
Eddie's hand - Eddie's finger on the trigger. Joe picks up
the black book - turns and makes his escape by going out the
office window and quickly descending the rusty fire escape.
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Scene 9 - Casting Concerns
We see three men sitting at a conference table RAYMOND(RAY)
HOTT -president of production, wearing a crisp blue
suit,VINCENT DARBY -senior vice-president, wearing a crisp
green suit and ROBERT SMITH -talent manager, wearing a crisp
brown suit. Ray and Mr. Darby sit at the head of the table
and Robert Smith sits along the side. A younger man -ADAM
KESHER enters and sits down, with an arrogant nonchalance,
next to Robert Smith. Adam is dressed in a frumpy old
fashioned plaid shirt, worn jacket, dark blue cotton slacks,
and a pair of old brown wing tips. As he sits he is holding
and twirling a vintage "7-iron" golf club.
ADAM
So what's the problem?
RAY
There is no problem.
ADAM
So why did you idiots bring me
here? ... I'm in the middle of making a
picture.
Silence for a moment. A man enters through a rear door and
whispers something to Mr. Darby and shows him something on a
piece of paper. Mr. Darby studies the piece of paper.
MR. DARBY
(to man who entered)
What was it last time?
The man who entered points to something on the paper.
MR. DARBY (cont'd)
Okay, let's try the next one.
The man nods and leaves.
RAY
He isn't gonna like it.
MR. DARBY
We'll see.
ADAM
Hello ... who're we talkin' about here?
Robert Smith shuffles nervously in his chair next to Adam.
ROBERT SMITH
You see Adam... there are some suggestions
which are to be brought forward ... and I
know you said you would entertain
suggestions and that's all anybody here
is asking you to do.
ADAM
What're you talking about?
ROBERT SMITH
An open mind ... You're in the process of
re-casting your lead actress and
I'm... (looks around) We're asking you to
keep an open mind.
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Scene 10 - The Conference Room Showdown
Before us is a huge modern office building of glass and
steel. Two men in dark suits have exited a large limousine
and are walking up into the building. We drift up the facade,
higher and higher moving in toward the top of the building.
DISSOLVE TO:
INT. OFFICE BUILDING - DAY
The men exit an elevator and move through a lobby where a
plaque beneath an enormous bronze sculpture reads "Ryan
Entertainment". Gliding we travel behind the two men down a
wide, carpeted hallway with blonde wood and glass on each
side. They enter through two large blonde wooden doors to the
conference room.
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INT. CONFERENCE ROOM - DAY
The men in dark suits go in as if they owned the place. Ray,
Mr. Darby and Robert Smith stand immediately. Adam remains
seated. Mr. Darby is the only one near enough to attempt a
hand shake, but when he offers his hand it is not taken. The
men in dark suits sit down without wasting a movement and
without acknowledging anyone. One of the men in a dark suit
opens a briefcase. Ray has been trying to make
introductions.
RAY
Ah... the Castigliane brothers. Let me
introduce you around ... please ... sit down.
(after they've already seated
themselves) ... this is Mr. Darby whom you
know and this is the director Adam
Kesher and his manager Robert Smith
The Castigliane brothers do not acknowledge any of this,
however, during the introductions the one with the briefcase
removes a photo of a girl and sets it in front of Ray.
RAY (cont'd)
Ah... she's very pretty.
We see the photo of the girl - of a nice looking blonde -
someone we've never seen before. Adam looks like he doesn't
know what's going on and he's getting upset about not
knowing. His manager, Robert Smith, is beginning to see the
makings of a confrontation - he's starting to panic.
MR. DARBY
(referring to Castigliane
brothers)
May I offer you gentlemen anything?
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
Espresso.
VINCENZO CASTIGLIANE
Nothing.
ADAM
Uh what's the photo for?
MR. DARBY
(picking up phone and speaking)
One espresso ... no, that's it.
(sets phone down - addresses
Castigliane brothers)
I think you're going to enjoy your
espresso this time... I've been doing
quite a bit of research knowing how hard
you are to please... this one comes highly
recommended.
ADAM
What's the photo for?
RAY
(to Adam)
A recommendation... a recommendation to
you Adam.
VINCENZO CASTIGLIANE
Not a recommendation.
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
This is the girl.
ADAM
What girl? For what? What is this Ray?
Ray, still standing with a forced smile, turns to the
Castigliane brothers.
RAY
We'd be happy to put her in the pile for
considerations ... you'd be pleased to know
there's quite a lot of interest in this
role.
ADAM
Interest?! There's six of the top
actresses that want this thing.
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
This is the girl.
ADAM
Ray...you better take care of this.
ROBERT SMITH
Hold on ... hold on, Adam.
ADAM
Hold on!!!!!!!! There's no way, there's
no way!!!
Luigi Castigliane's espresso is brought in by the man who had
been in earlier. The man sets the espresso down in front of
Luigi and takes a step back. The room becomes silent -
watching the Espresso Man and Luigi. Without looking up Luigi
speaks softly.
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
Napkin.
ESPRESSO MAN
(leading forward to hear)
Pardon?
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
Napkin.
ESPRESSO MAN
Of course. Excuse me.
The Espresso Man leaves the room. Luigi looks at the
espresso. Vincenzo stares at Adam.
Adam is doing his best to stare down Vincenzo. The Espresso
man returns with a cloth napkin and lays it down next to the
espresso.
ESPRESSO MAN (cont'd)
Will that be all, Sir?
Luigi doesn't answer and after a moment of standing very
still waiting, the Espresso Man turns and leaves the room.
Adam is stared down by Vincenzo and averts his eyes to the
espresso cup. He looks around at Ray and Mr. Darby - seeing
them stare at the espresso cup.
Vincenzo keeps staring at Adam.
Luigi picks up the napkin and holds it in his left hand.
With his right hand he lifts the espresso cup and places it
above the napkin. He brings the cup and napkin to his mouth.
He takes a sip of espresso. A small fleeting expression forms
on Luigi's impassive face as if for one millisecond he is
going to vomit. His mouth opens and he allows the espresso
to fall and dribble onto the napkin. He pushes any remaining
espresso in his mouth out with his tongue. He holds it in
that position for a moment.
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
Is shit!
Luigi Castigliane stands up.
RAY
I'm sorry. That was a highly
recommended...
MR. DARBY
That's considered one of the finest
espressos in the world , Sir.
Luigi just stands there. A small thread on his left suit
jacket pocket catches his attention and he smooths it back
into the fabric. Vincenzo closes his briefcase, takes out a
hankerchief and cleans his nose - then stands, placing the
handkerchief back in his pocket.
ADAM
Wait a minute!! What's going on here?
Vincenzo just stares toward Adam as if he's not even there.
ADAM
There's no way that girl is in my movie!
Silence.
LUIGI CASTIGLIANE
That is the girl.
The Castigliane brothers begin to leave. Adam stands up
trembling with anger.
ADAM
Hey!!!!! That girl is not in my film!!!
VINCENZO CASTIGLIANE
It is no longer your film.
Adam turns white and stands very still as this sinks in. The
Castigliane brothers leave. As the big blonde wood doors
close behind them Adam starts to boil.
ADAM
(screaming)
You'd better fix this, Ray!!!
RAY
I'll speak to someone.
ADAM
(turning to his manager)
And you'd better speak to someone
too ... or find yourself another client!!
This smells like a set-up to me!
(back to Ray)
And by the way, Ray, I don't know who
these guys are kidding, but every foot of
film I've shot is in a vault at the lab
that only I can access. No one's getting
that film!!
ROBERT SMITH
This is a catastrophe...
(turning toward Ray)
you told me they might insist on a girl,
that's all.
ADAM
Why didn't you tell me, Robert? That's
what I mean ... you set me up! I woulda
never come here.
(standing)
I'm leaving. I'm a director you don't
want to lose ... you guys better fix this!!
Adam storms out of the room.
RAY
(standing)
Well...I didn't know that was going to
happen.
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EXTERIOR - OFFICE BUILDING - CENTURY CITY - DAY
Adam exits the building carrying his 7-iron. An attendant
takes his valet parking ticket. While Adam, still fuming,
waits for his car he notices the big limo standing off to one
side. He stares at the car and the huge limo driver leaning
up against the front driver's side door.
Adam's car arrives - a late model Porsche. Before Adam gets
into his car he addresses the attendant.
ADAM
Did the Castigliane brothers get out of
that limo?
ATTENDANT
They two guys in dark suits?
Adam nods and walks over to the limo. The limo driver eyes
him and his 7-iron suspiciously.
ADAM
Castigliane brothers?
LIMO DRIVER
Beat it!
ADAM
O.K.
Adam raises his 7-iron and smashes out the limo's windshield.
He whacks two big dents in the hood, then smashes out a
headlight. The limo driver starts towards him. Adam laughs,
runs to his car and takes off.
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Scene 11 - Mysteries Unravel
Betty is stretched out on the big leather couch in the living
room. A half eaten sandwich and chips are on a plate on the
coffee table next to her. She is talking on the phone.
BETTY
No Grandpa, you wouldn't believe it.
It's more beautiful than I ever
dreamed ... no she left me a lot of food.
The refrigerator's full ... Aunt Ruthie
said she'd call me when she got
settled... it was real smooth. I sat next
to a lady who gave up her first class
seat to a boy with a broken leg. She was
so nice to me. She invited me to her
house sometime. It's in Bel Air which is
a place where people have a lot of
money... I will. Everybody's telling me
to be careful, but I sure love it here
Grandpa. Thank you for helping me get
here ... yeah, it's long distance. I love
you. Say hello to Grams. Give her a big
kiss for me. Okay, I love you
Grandpa ... bye.
Betty hangs up the phone, takes a big bite of her sandwich
and lays flat out on the couch, chewing and smiling up at the
ceiling. She suddenly remembers Rita and her promise to look
in on her. She gets off the couch and goes into the bedroom.
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INT. BEDROOM - DAY
Rita is still asleep when she enters. She leans down and
finds Rita breathing normally. She feels her forehead.
Satisfied that all is well, Betty quietly leaves the bedroom.
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INT. - EXT. APARTMENT - DAY
Betty rinses her dishes in the kitchen sink and pours herself
a cup of coffee. She takes the coffee outside to the
courtyard - to a white metal table just outside her doorway.
She sits down and stretches in the warm afternoon sun.
Across the way she can hear a blues saxophonist practicing in
one of the apartments. She drinks her coffee and listens to
the music.
Some birds fly by overhead. She takes another sip of coffee.
The blues music which was mellow and slow is now building in
tempo and volume. The phone inside rings. Betty takes her
coffee back into the living room, shutting the door behind
her. She crosses to the leather couch and picks up the
phone.
BETTY (cont'd)
Hello ... Aunt Ruth!! I can't tell you how
happy I am. Your place is so fantastic!
Yes ... Coco...what a character. I really
like her... that's too bad...waiting in an
airport must not be too fun. What's a
mosquito plane? ... Oh I get it. How long
does that take from Montreal? ... Well,
you'll sleep good tonight ... Hudson Bay
sounds beautiful ...oh well, I hope you
packed your coat. (laughs). You mean
the audition...Wally Brown... she didn't
mention it but he'll fax the dialogue to
Coco? Suddenly I'm so nervous ... okay
Aunt Ruth... I'll try. I'll study those
lines until I know them inside out.
Yes, either right here on this fabulous
leather couch or I'll take them with a
coffee in the courtyard like a regular
movie star. (laughs). Oh! I got a real
shock to find your friend Rita here. She
was in the shower and I opened the
door ... Rita ... what do you mean? She was
in an accident ... your friend Rita. No,
Coco unlocked the door. No, she didn't
see her. She's sleeping. No... she's
very nice. I'm sure there's some
explanation, Aunt Ruth... I don't think we
have to do that. Please don't worry.
I'll take care of it. No, I'll let you
know. Where can I ... okay I'll get it
from Coco.
No, please don't worry... thank you so
much for letting me stay here. You've
made me so happy... thank you, thank you.
Please don't worry... Aunt Ruth we don't
need the police. I'll call you when you
get to Hudson Bay. Please...
please ... Goodbye Aunt Ruth.
Betty slowly and quietly hangs up the phone. She sits for a
moment listening. Silently she stands and moves toward the
bedroom. As she approaches the bedroom door she stops at
something she sees. Rita is sitting on the edge of the bed
crying quietly. Betty goes into the bedroom. Rita looks up
at her with desperation.
BETTY (cont'd)
You're awake... I think I misunderstood
you. I thought you knew my Aunt and
that's why you were here. I just talked
to my Aunt on the phone and she wants me
to call the police.
Rita starts crying harder, bows down, covering her face with
her hands.
BETTY (cont'd)
Rita?
RITA
(crying harder)
I'm... sorry. I ...
Betty's heart softens.
BETTY
What is it Rita?
RITA
(still sobbing)
I'm...I'm... oh no... I thought when I woke
up... I thought sleep would do it ...
Betty kneels down in front of her.
BETTY
What's wrong?
RITA
(crying)
I don't know who I am.
BETTY
What do you mean? You're Rita.
RITA
(crying)
I'm not. I don't know what my name is.
I don't know who I am!!
Betty looks down at the purse next to Rita's dress. She picks
it up and hands it to Rita.
BETTY
This is your purse. Your name must be in
your purse.
Rita takes the purse with sudden trepidation. She hesitates.
Something is worrying her. She looks at Betty for help.
BETTY (cont'd)
You want to know don't you?
RITA
I ... yes, but ... I ...
BETTY
Open it!
Rita slowly unzips the purse. The pressure of its contents
force the mouth of the purse to widen as the zipper opens and
then there is suddenly revealed what will later be known to
be $125,000.00 cash in hundred dollar bills.
Both Rita and Betty almost stop breathing. They look at each
other, then back to the money.
Rita takes the massive wad of bills out of the purse and sets
it on the bed. She reaches back inside and comes up with the
only other remaining item in the purse ... A BLUE KEY. Betty
sees Rita's expression change to a kind of horror.
(note: This blue key is made of very fine heavy metal and
does not look like a door key.)
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INTERIOR - OFFICE BUILDING - DAY
Ray crosses a carpeted closed area. He mounts a flight of
stairs. At the top of the stairs there's a plain blonde wood
door. Ray punches in a code on a security panel next to it.
The door opens automatically. Ray passes through and goes
down a narrow hall. At the end of the hall there is a small
elevator. Again Ray punches in a code. The elevator opens and
Ray goes in. The elevator door closes, but the elevator does
not move. Ray waits. Finally, a woman's voice comes through a
speaker.
WOMAN'S VOICE
Who is it please?
RAY
Raymond Harris ... 20743.
The elevator begins to move up. When it stops, the door opens
and Ray walks into a windowless reception area where a
beautiful Italian woman sits behind a large, blonde, modern,
built-in desk.
RECEPTIONIST
(very quietly)
You may go right in, Ray.
Ray crosses to a blonde wood double door and waits. The
receptionist pushes a button behind her desk - chimes sound
as the double doors open to an enormous office with no
windows. Heavy rich brown curtains line the walls.
Ray enters and the doors close behind him. Ray takes a few
steps forward, then stops. There is a solid glass wall that
we now notice running the width of the office. Cut into the
glass wall is a small speaker microphone apparatus. Beyond
the glass off in the center of the room is a man sitting in a
very plain, blonde, wood, modern, yet not motorized,
wheelchair. The man is paralyzed except for his right hand
and head. His head appears small in relation to the size of
his body. His suit is immaculate and one of the finest we've
ever seen. His manservant stands in the shadows behind him.
RAY
Good afternoon Mr. Roque. (pronounced
Rowk).
Mr. Roque stares at Ray silently.
RAY (cont'd)
Do you want him replaced?
Mr. Roque continues to stare.
RAY
I know they said...
MR. ROQUE
Then?
RAY
Then... I guess it's so .... alright, but
that means we should ...
MR. ROQUE
Yes?
RAY
Shut everything down ... Is that something
that...do you want us to shut everything
down?
Silence. Ray doesn't know what to do. He struggles to
interpret Mr. Roque's silence. He waits. Mr. Roque does
nothing but stare.
RAY (cont'd)
Then we'll shut everything down.
Silence.
Ray turns. The doors open as he approaches them and he
leaves the room. The doors close.
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EXTERIOR - OFFICE BUILDING - CENTURY CITY
Vincenzo and Luigi are staring silently and without
expression at the broken windshield of the limousine. The
limousine driver suddenly starts signaling to a car entering
the driveway to the building. He turns to the Castigliane
brothers.
LIMO DRIVER
The other car is here sirs. Please allow
me.
The limo driver opens the rear door of the new limo, then
hurries around and opens the other rear door. The new driver
gets out of the car.
LIMO DRIVER (cont'd)
Here's the key to the car. Take it
straight to the garage. They're waiting
for you.
The limo driver closes both back doors after the Castigliane
brothers are seated within. He then gets in himself and
maneuvers the big limo out into traffic.
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PINK'S CHILI DOGS - DAY
Two guys, JOE ( the guy who killed Ed in the sixth floor
office) and BILLY another unkept, rocker type delivery man
are standing waiting for their chili dogs with a girl, LANEY,
who could be very good looking but she seems to be in poor
health. Her hair is long and stringy. She's wearing a
tight, short sleeve blue sweater, black jeans and boots.
BILLY
Yeah, sure. Look what happened to them.
JOE
No, no, no, I told you. They're fine.
They're all real happy.
BILLY
My next delivery is up that way, so I'll
be getting down to it real soon.
JOE
You're so easy.
BILLY
Gotta keep an eye on her, that's all.
JOE
Yeah, what for?
BILLY
Keep her from gettin' in trouble, that's
all.
The chili dogs arrive and they pay for them.
BILLY (cont'd)
Can we eat in the van?
JOE
What's the matter now?
BILLY
Nothing... I don't like being out in the
open like this.
JOE
It must be just so pathetic being you.
Sure Billy, grab your dog we'll eat in
the van.
The three make their way to the van. Joe looks over at
Laney.
JOE (cont'd)
You sure you don't want anything?
LANEY
(hesitantly)
Not here...no thanks.
JOE
Not a coke or anything?
LANEY
No ... thanks though... I'll take a
cigarette if you have one.
JOE
Sure, reach in my shirt pocket there.
As Laney is getting her cigarette and lighting it..
JOE (cont'd)
Any new girls on the street these days?
LANEY
(taking her first big drag)
No. I haven't seen any.
JOE
A brunette? ... maybe beat up?
LANEY
No...
JOE
You'll keep your eyes open for me won't
you baby?
LANEY
Sure.
Joe spanks her butt as she gets in the van.
JOE
You bet you will.
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Scene 12 - The Call
Mr. Roque, in his wheelchair is still in the center of the
huge softly lit, windowless office. His manservant standing
silently behind him. The small built-in wheelchair phone
rings. Mr. Roque pushes a button on a small intricate remote
device he holds in his right hand. A slender streamlined
microphone rises from the arm of the chair.
MR. ROQUE
Yes?
He listens through a high-tech earplant which we now see.
MR. ROQUE (cont'd)
Thank you.
He pushes two buttons, one after another on the remote
device. We hear a small click, a dial tone, a number being
dialed, and a phone ringing.
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INT. DARK ELEGANT ROOM - SOMEWHERE - SIMULTANEOUS
We see the back of a man's head and just over his shoulder we
see the top of the phone which is ringing. The man picks up
the phone and brings the receiver to his ear.
THE MAN
Hello.
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INT. MR. ROQUE'S OFFICE - SIMULTANEOUS
MR. ROQUE
She's still missing.
We hear a small click and the line goes dead. Mr. Roque
pushes a button and the microphone descends back into the
chair.
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INT. DARK ELEGANT ROOM - SOMEWHERE
Again we see the back of the man's head. He's dialing a new
number. -He brings the receiver to his ear. We hear a phone
ringing - we hear a click- the phone being answered.
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INT. FILTHY LOW CLASS KITCHEN - SOMEWHERE - SIMULTANEOUS
We see only a black rotary wall phone and a portion of a
greasy filthy kitchen - The receiver has already been lifted
off the phone and we see only the cord extending to someone
off screen.
HAIRY-ARMED MAN
(off screen)
Talk to me...
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Scene 13 - Mystery and Amnesia
Again we see only the back of the man's head.
THE MAN
Same.
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INT. FILTHY LOW CLASS KITCHEN - SOMEWHERE - SIMULTANEOUS
A man's hairy-arm enters frame and the receiver is placed
back on the phone, then immediately picked back up and with
the receiver held in the hand the hairy man dials a new
number. Part way through the dialing...
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INT. A BLUE TABLE - SOMEWHERE - SIMULTANEOUS
The surface of this table is high gloss ultra smooth
material. A very modern phone sits on this table and begins
to ring softly. A hand enters frame - a woman's hand. The
skin is pale white, almost translucent. The fingers are long
and seem slightly too large. At the ends of the fingers and
thumb are stretched tapered high gloss red fingernails which
slightly curve downward. The forefinger of the hand presses
a button on the phone. A small tone sounds - followed by a
very modern sounding coded signal.
FADE OUT:
INT. - AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - day
We pull back from Rita's face until we see that Betty and
Rita are sitting on the leather couch about four feet apart
staring at the floor. They just sit this way for awhile.
BETTY
Well... what do you think about then? I
mean... well what do you think about?
RITA
What do you mean?
BETTY
Well ... if you don't remember anything, I
mean what goes through your mind then if
you don't remember anything?
RITA
Nothing. I do remember the car crash... I
told you... I remember the glass ... I
think about that sometimes ... I remember
walking here, sort of. Now I remember
this place and you. That's about it.
BETTY
How do you remember how to talk?
RITA
I don't know.
BETTY
You don't remember anything else?
RITA
No
(she covers her eyes with her
hands)
There is something...something there I
can't tell... I can't describe it.
(struggling to figure it out -
to express it)
There are things there.... but I'm... here.
Betty thinks about what Rita has said. Somehow it seems to
make sense to her.
BETTY
The money. You don't know where it came
from?
RITA
Unh, unh.
BETTY
When you think about them... the
money... the key ... does it make you
remember anything?
Silence.
RITA
The money... I don't know about the
money... the key... it makes me feel ...
afraid.
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BEVERLY HILLS CITY STREETS - DAY
A car - a late model generic sedan is moving toward us. Two
men dressed in suits and wearing dark glasses are driving
slowly. As they go each man is scanning sidewalks,
buildings, passing cars as if hunting for someone. They pass
by us and as we turn we leave them and pick-up Adam driving
in the opposite direction in the other lane. We stay with
Adam.
Adam drives his Porsche up a palm lined street.
ADAM
Office...
The voice activated phone connects the line to Adam's office.
A secretary answers.
SECRETARY
Adam Kesher's office.
ADAM
It's me. Where's Cynthia?
SECRETARY
She's on the set. I'll connect you Mr.
Kesher.
Another ringing sound, then a voice.
VOICE
Stage One.
SECRETARY
Paul, I have Mr. Kesher for Cynthia.
PAUL
Right baby, all Hell's broke loose down
here. I'll try to find her.
Adam listens to dead silence for a moment or two then Cynthia
speaks.
CYNTHIA
Adam, where are you?
ADAM
What's going on, Cynthia?
CYNTHIA
They've closed the set. They sent
everybody home.
ADAM
What did you say?
CYNTHIA
They fired everyone.
ADAM
Who fired everyone?
CYNTHIA
(starting to cry)
Ray did ... and then they closed the
set.... everybody's gone. You'd better
get down here Adam!
ADAM
No.
CYNTHIA
You've got to talk to Ray you've got to
fix this.
ADAM
I'm going home.
CYNTHIA
Home! Meet me at the office. We've got
to do something ... you've got to do
something Adam!
ADAM
I'm going home Cynthia.
CYNTHIA
Adam, this isn't like you. Please come
to the office. There must be something
we can do.
ADAM
I'm going home. I'll call you later.
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Scene 14 - Call the Police
ESTABLISH
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INT . AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - DAY
The girls are still sitting on the leather couch as before,
but now silently off in their own worlds. After a moment...
BETTY
I wonder where you were going.
Betty's question hangs in the air. Slowly we move close to
Rita who is on the verge of remembering something.
Suddenly -
RITA
Mulholland Drive.
BETTY
Mulholland Drive?
RITA
That's where I was going... Mulholland
Drive.
BETTY
Maybe that's where the accident was.
There must be a police report. We could
call.
RITA
No.... I don't...
BETTY
We could call anonymously from a pay
phone... just to see if there was an
accident.
Rita sits worrying.
BETTY (cont'd)
Come on. It'll be just like in the
movies. We'll pretend to be someone
else. I want to walk around anyway. I'm
in Hollywood and I haven't even seen any
of it. Come on Rita. Do you feel up to
it?
RITA
Okay... but just...just to see.
BETTY
Just to see if there was an accident on
Mulholland Drive.
RITA
(tentatively)
Okay.
BETTY
Come on... let's find you something to
wear.
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AUNT RUTH'S BEDROOM - DAY
Betty laughs as she holds one of Ruth's dresses in front of
Rita.
BETTY
It's terrible ... My Aunt dresses like Miss
Marple.
(off a blank stare from Rita )
She's kind of a frumpy woman detective in
British movies.
Rita laughs along with Betty. Betty goes back in the closet.
BETTY (cont'd)
Here's something okay.
She brings out a pair of khaki pants.
BETTY (cont'd)
Try these on. You can wear one of my T-
shirts with it and it won't look bad with
those sandals.
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Scene 15 - Unexpected Discovery
Adam pulls into his driveway, but is blocked from entering
the garage by a poolman's truck. He gets out of the car and
looks at the truck - sees the insignia on the door which is a
blue square with the word "Gene" above and the word "Clean"
below. Adam hears steps behind him and turns. A JAPANESE
GARDENER is coming toward him smiling and bowing.
JAPANESE GARDENER
Ah, Mister ... you remember me. I am Taka.
your gardener. For long time I not see
you. I pleased to see you.
Taka reaches out his hand and Adam shakes it.
ADAM
Hello Taka. It's 'cause I'm never home
in the day time. It's good to see you
again. The garden looks great.
Taka bows, smiling and nodding, and goes back to work. Adam
heads toward the front door of his house.
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INT. - ADAM'S HOUSE - DAY
Adam enters, puts his 7-iron in his golf bag just inside the
door, then looks around. He can see the pool through a wall
of plate glass windows, but there is no one visible poolside.
ADAM
(calling out)
Lorraine...
(then louder)
Lorraine ... you home?
He hears a noise, something falling. He walks in the
direction of the noise. It leads him to his bedroom. His
expression darkens as he approaches the closed door. He
hears voices as he throws the door open.
LORRAINE and the poolman GENE are in bed.
LORRAINE
Now, you've done it!
GENE
Just forget you ever saw it. It's better
that way.
LORRAINE
What the hell are you even doing here?
Adam stands stunned for a moment. Then finds himself walking
over to the dresser and opening the top drawer. He removes a
large case.
LORRAINE (cont'd)
What are you doing?
Adam starts walking out of the bedroom with the case.
LORRAINE (cont'd)
THAT'S MY JEWELRY!!!
Adam leaves the bedroom and starts through the house. He
goes into the kitchen and looks around - numb but trying to
think.
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Scene 16 - Paint and Fury
Lorraine is getting dressed as fast as she can.
LORRAINE
That bastard!
GENE
He's probably upset Lorraine.
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INT. ADAM'S KITCHEN - DAY
Adam leaves the kitchen and goes out into the garage. He
turns on the light and looks around. He spots some paint
cans on a shelf and grabs one and goes back into the kitchen.
He can hear Lorraine calling his name. She seems to be
coming closer. He sets the jewelry case and the paint can on
the floor, kneels down and opens the paint can with his car
key. Just as Lorraine enters the kitchen, he opens the
jewelry box and empties the 3/4 full gallon can of Hot Pink
paint into her jewelry case.
LORRAINE
WHAT.. ARE ... YOU ... DOING!!!???
He puts his hands into the paint and jewels and smushes them
about. Lorraine rushes toward him.
LORRAINE (cont'd)
STOP IT!!!
Lorraine grabs hold of him. Starts pulling his hair,
slapping his face. She tears his jacket. Adam stands all at
once and with his wet Hot Pink hands he pushes Lorraine and
slams her into the kitchen counter just as Gene the poolman
enters. Gene grabs ahold of Adam, cocks back and slams his
huge suntanned fist into Adam's face.
GENE
That's not a way to treat your wife,
buddy. I don't care what she's done.
Adam gets up off the floor bleeding from the nose and tries
to hit Gene. Gene blocks his punch and slams Adam again,
knocking him down to the kitchen floor where he lands and
spills the jewelry case. Adam, now covered with paint, is
picked up by Gene and thrown out toward the front door.
LORRAINE
Throw him out!
Lorraine opens the front door while Gene picks Adam up, moves
him across the carpet and heaves him out onto the front lawn.
Lorraine slams the door behind him.
Adam picks himself up, severely dazed and bleeding pretty
badly, he heads for his car.
Taka stops gardening and smiles and bows at Adam as he gets
into his car.
Adam drives away - pink paint and red blood all over.
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Scene 17 - Rita and Betty Leave Aunt Ruth's House
Rita is now dressed to go out and is studying herself in a
mirror. She turns and her gaze falls to her purse. She
picks it up and looks questioningly at Betty.
BETTY (cont'd)
No ... you shouldn't take that. Let's hide
it.
They look around the room... There's a hatbox in the closet
above the clothes rack. Betty brings it down, takes out the
hat, and Rita puts the purse inside. Betty puts the hat over
the purse in the hatbox and puts in back in the closet.
Betty puts out her hand. Rita looks at it for a moment,
smiles, and they shake.
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EXT. APARTMENT COURTYARD - DAY
All dressed now Betty and Rita leave Aunt Ruth's apartment
and walk across the courtyard past Coco's apartment and out
through the iron gates. No one is about.
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EXT. HOLLYWOOD RESIDENTIAL STREET - DAY
Betty and Rita walk along. Birds are chirping in the trees
which line both sides of the street. Betty is smiling and
once again looking around at everything. Her good mood and
excitement about life lifts Rita's spirits.
Coming toward them on the sidewalk are two people - a middle-
aged woman and a young boy around 10 years old. The boy is
very thin and something is wrong with him as he is walking
awkwardly on crutches. As the two groups pass each other on
the sidewalk Betty is struck deeply by the boy's brilliant,
luminous blue eyes which are at once innocent and filled with
wisdom.
After they pass each other Betty turns back and sees the boy
and the woman enter 1612 Havenhurst. Betty and Rita continue
up the street.
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Scene 18 - An Unexplained Accident
The girls walk along the busy boulevard, past guitar shops,
video stores. Betty is looking for a payphone. Rita's eyes
dart back and forth nervously. She's beginning to feel
frightened.
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PAYPHONE ON RED BRICK WALL - DAY
We see the red brick building. It is Denny's. Betty and
Rita are walking to the payphone. Betty digs out some change
from her purse. She picks up the receiver, drops in a
quarter and dials the "0" for Operator. An Operator answers.
BETTY
Hollywood Police Department please.
OPERATOR
Is this an emergency?
BETTY
No, no, I just want the number.
OPERATOR
Hold for the number.
Betty gets the number for the Hollywood Police Station, re-
deposits the quarter and dials.
VOICE
Hollywood Police Department
BETTY
I'm inquiring about an accident that
happened last night on Mulholland Drive.
VOICE
Hold please. I'll connect you to
traffic.
Betty holds.
SERGEANT BAXTER
Traffic. Sergeant Baxter speaking.
BETTY
Hi. I'm inquiring ...well, I heard a
sound last night that sounded like a car
crash and I want to know if there was an
accident on Mulholland Drive.
SERGEANT BAXTER
Yes, there was.
BETTY
Can you tell me what happened?
SERGEANT BAXTER
No. I can't.
BETTY
Was anyone hurt?
SERGEANT BAXTER
May I have your name please?
Betty hangs up. She turns to Rita smiling like a girl who's
done something bad and gotten away with it.
BETTY
There was an accident. He wouldn't tell
me anything else, but that was your
accident Rita. I just know it was.
Maybe there's something about it in the
papers. Come on I'll buy you a cup of
coffee and we can see.
Betty and Rita enter Denny's.
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Scene 19 - Waitress Under Suspicion
Rita and Betty are seated next to the table where Dan and
Herb sat earlier in the day. They both have a cup of coffee
in front of them. Betty has a newspaper open and she is
scanning the last pages.
BETTY (cont'd)
Maybe it happened so late it's not going
to be in today's paper.
RITA
There's nothing?
BETTY
Not that I can see.
The same waitress - Diane, comes up to the girl's table and
freshens up their coffee. Betty looks up and smiles, sees
Diane's nameplate.
BETTY (cont'd)
Thank you ... Diane.
Rita shoots a look from Betty to Diane to the nameplate.
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close-up nameplate
The word "DIANE" is huge from Rita's POV.
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Back to scene
Diane finishes pouring Rita's cup and smiles at Betty.
DIANE
You're welcome. Will that be all? You
want your check?
BETTY
Just the coffee. Rita, you want
something?
RITA
(still staring at the nameplate
- thinking)
No. Just the coffee.
BETTY
We'll take our check.
Diane searches through her many checks to find Betty and
Rita's.
The manager of Denny's, standing with a woman in a blue
dress, calls Diane's name. Diane turns and looks to the
manager and the woman. A fleeting fear goes through her
eyes. She surreptitiously reaches in her pocket and takes
out a Mont Blanc fountain pen which she puts under Betty's
check as she places it on their table. She does this very
quickly but Betty notices this and Diane notices Betty
noticing. Diane walks quickly over to the manager and the
woman in the blue dress. Betty turns and watches a heated
conversation that she can't hear, but she sees the woman in
the blue dress searching her purse and shrugging and then
leaving.
The manager says something to Diane and Diane turns her
pockets inside out and pats herself down in front of the
manager showing him her innocence. He waves her off and she
goes behind the counter to retrieve an order of food. Betty
stops watching and turns her attention to Rita, who is tense
and lost in a thought.
BETTY (cont'd)
What is it Rita?
RITA
(without moving a muscle)
Shhhh.
At that moment Diane the waitress reappears at their table.
Diane looks Betty in the eye and while looking at Betty her
left hand slides the Mont Blanc out from under the check and
back into her pocket.
DIANE
Thank you. Come in again.
Betty holds her gaze.
BETTY
You're welcome. We will.
Relieved Diane leaves and goes about her business. Betty
looks over at Rita waiting for her to tell her something.
Rita slowly turns and focuses on Betty.
RITA
I remember something... I remember
something!
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Scene 20 - The Search for Diane Selwyn
Betty and Rita are walking back to the apartment. We see
them from a distance. They are talking and gesturing in an
excited and animated way. Just after they enter through the
iron gates of 1612 Havenhurst and are out of sight we notice
a car moving slowly up Havenhurst toward us. We notice two
men in the front seat who seem to be looking around for
something.
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INT. - AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - DAY
The door slams shut. Rita grabs Betty's shoulders.
RITA
Diane Selwyn. Maybe it's my name.
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AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - MOMENTS LATER
Betty and Rita are sitting next to each other on the leather
couch. Betty is rifling through the phone book. She finds
the listings for Selwyn. Her finger drifts down and finds D.
Selwyn followed by an address and phone number. It is the
only Selwyn with a D. first name. She hands the phone to
Rita.
BETTY
Strange to be calling yourself.
RITA
Maybe it's not me.
BETTY
Call the number.
Betty reads the number off and Rita pushes the corresponding
buttons. Each tone seems to be louder than the last. The
ringing seems deafening. There's a click and the phone is
answered - by a machine. A woman's voice is heard - loudly.
WOMAN'S VOICE
(coming from answering machine)
Hi ... this is me. Leave me a message.
Betty now has her ear pressed up against the phone also -
straining to hear everything. The machine starts recording.
Betty hangs up the phone immediately.
RITA
It's not my voice ... but I know her.
BETTY
Maybe the voice isn't Diane Selwyn.
Maybe that's your roommate or if it is
Diane Selwyn she can tell you who you
are.
RITA
Maybe...maybe ... maybe.
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Scene 21 - Unwelcome Visitor
Taka is bowing and smiling and nodding to someone we don't
see.
TAKA'S POV - A man, KENNY, in a sharp black suit is walking
down the driveway past Gene the Poolman's truck to the front
door of Adam's house. Parked at the street is a big limo
with Vincenzo and Luigi Castigliane sitting in the back.
Kenny knocks on Adam's front door. Lorraine answers.
Lorraine's hands are covered with pink paint. Pink paint is
on her face and clothes.
KENNY
Adam Kesher...he...
LORRAINE
Yeah, right ... get lost!
She slams the door, but Kenny's foot stops it and pushes it
back with a force that shakes the wall as the door slams open
once again. Kenny enters the house.
KENNY
This is Adam Kesher's house. Where...
LORRAINE
Like hell it is! Get out ... NOW!!!
Gene comes out of the kitchen fast, his hands covered with
pink paint.
GENE
I guess you don't understand English.
She asked to leave. Here's the door.
Gene grabs hold of Kenny and starts to push him out the door.
Kenny rabbit punches Gene in the nose with lightning speed -
his fist like a sledgehammer. Gene goes down. Lorraine
shrieks and leaps on Kenny. Her long fingernails going for
his eyes. Kenny slaps Lorraine hard. The shriek stops
instantly and she falls out cold on the carpet. Gene is back
up and going for Kenny. Kenny gets three punches in on Gene's
head before Gene hits the ground unconscious. Kenny rubs some
pink paint off his hands and tries to get a pink stain off
his jacket. He begins walking around the house calling out
for Adam. He sees nothing and hears nothing. He goes back to
the front door and sees Adam's golf clubs sitting there.
Kenny begins snapping the shaft of each club. As he snaps
each club we see Lorraine and Gene remain out cold on the
floor.
And in the kitchen we see that the tap is on and the sink
water is now overflowing from the sink and jewelry box -
spilling out onto the kitchen floor. Finishing his work with
the vintage golf clubs - Kenny leaves.
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Scene 22 - Unveiling Mysterious Visitors
Kenny jumps into the front seat of the limo. Vincenzo and
Luigi nod to the driver and they take off.
Taka hoes some weeds beneath a Jacaranda.
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L.A. AERIAL SHOT HIGH ANGLE - NIGHT
Night descends on Los Angeles. Millions of lights down below
twinkle like stars.
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EXT. 1612 HAVENHURST - NIGHT
We see the courtyard at night. Some of the apartment windows
have dim, warm lights. Most all is in darkness. The only
sound is the water flowing in the fountain with muted distant
traffic. Far away a siren wails softly.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
Betty and Rita are on their hands and knees around the coffee
table. A map of L.A. is unfolded and Betty is running her
finger along a street. Her finger stops.
BETTY
It's right about here on Sierra Bonita.
That's not too far away.
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EXT. COURTYARD - SIMULTANEOUS
An older, beautiful woman - drunk, is walking slowly -
strangely toward the door of Aunt Ruth's apartment.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - NIGHT - SIMULTANEOUS
BETTY
What's wrong with that?
RITA
I'm not sure about this.
BETTY
I know you're afraid of something. We'll
be careful. Tomorrow we'll go over there
and we'll find out.
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EXT. 1612 HAVENHURST COURTYARD - NIGHT
The woman moves up to the door we see her face. Her eyes have
the eerie look of one possessed. She knocks mechanically on
the door.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT
Betty and Rita both turn with alarm. Betty gets up, stares
at the door, then at Rita. Rita waits, not knowing what to
do.
BETTY
It'll be okay.
Betty opens the door. Betty finds the face of the actress,
LOUISE BONNER, staring questioningly at her.
BETTY (cont'd)
Yes? May I help you?
LOUISE
Where is Ruth?
BETTY
Ruth's gone on a film. I'm her niece
Betty. Who are you?
LOUISE
Someone is in trouble. Who are you? Why
are you in Ruth's apartment?
BETTY
I'm her niece. She's letting me stay
here. My name is Betty.
LOUISE
No it isn't. That's not it. That's not
what she said. Something bad's happening.
Where's Ruth?
BETTY
I'm sorry, but I don't know who you are
and I'm...
COCO
Louise... what're are you doing Louise?
Louise turns and sees Coco approaching across the courtyard.
LOUISE
Where have you been Coco? God, I've been
trying to find you all afternoon since
3:00 o'clock. That one is in my room and
she won't leave. I want you to get her
out. I want you to get her out now.
Coco comes up and grabs hold of Louise. She turns over to
Betty.
COCO
This is Louise Bonner. I'm sure she
meant well.
(looking over to Louise)
This is Betty, Ruth's niece. In fact and
fortunately I was just coming to see
Betty. Betty's a young actress and I'm
delivering faxed pages of a scene for her
audition tomorrow. Here they are honey.
Now come along Louise and I'll take you
home.
(back to Betty)
Sorry about this. Sometimes it happens.
LOUISE
No, she said it was someone else in
trouble.
COCO
Stop it, Louise. Let's get you
home ... goodnight Betty.
Coco takes Louise back through the darkness of the courtyard.
Betty closes the door and turns.
BETTY
Whoa!
She catches Rita's look. Rita is staring at her, horrified.
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Scene 23 - Financial Quandary
Establish
INT. BEVERLY HILLS HOTEL - CORRIDOR OUTSIDE ROOM 214
A Hotel Manager is walking toward the door of room 214. He
knocks softly on the door. The door opens and Adam Kesher is
standing there - still beaten looking with remnants of pink
paint.
ADAM
Yes...what is it?
HOTEL MANAGER
I'm sorry Mr. Kesher, but there seems to
be some problem concerning your credit
card.
ADAM
... What??
HOTEL MANAGER
The fact is Mr. Kesher a representative
of your bank called us.
ADAM
How... how'd they know I was here?
HOTEL MANAGER
I don't know. All we do is take an
impression of the credit card and until
you check out it just sits in our files.
ADAM
So, what did they say?
HOTEL MANAGER
Well, Sir, I'm afraid they said you're
overdrawn at your bank and your line of
credit has been cancelled.
ADAM
Unbelievable. Look... here.
(Adam taking out his wallet.)
I don't know what's going on.
That's so much baloney. I've got enough
cash for one night, okay?
HOTEL MANAGER
That's fine, Mr. Kesher. You can pay
cash when you check out. I'm sorry. it
was my duty to inform you.
ADAM
Fine. I'll check out in the morning.
HOTEL MANAGER
Have a good evening, Mr. Kesher.
The Hotel Manager turns to leave and Adam closes the door.
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Scene 24 - Adam's Financial Crisis
Adam crosses the room to the phone and dials a number. The
phone is answered.
ADAM
Someone's shut off my money!
CYNTHIA
I know. Where are you Adam?
ADAM
What do you mean "you know"?
CYNTHIA
Someone called me. When they couldn't
get you they told me you were as good as
broke. I didn't believe then, so I made
some calls.
ADAM
And?
CYNTHIA
You're broke!
ADAM
But I'm not broke.
CYNTHIA
I know, but you're broke. Where are you?
ADAM
Beverly Hills Hotel. I've got enough
cash in my pocket for one night.
CYNTHIA
Do you know somebody called the The
Cowboy?
ADAM
The Cowboy??
CYNTHIA
Yeah, the Cowboy. This guy, the Cowboy,
wants to see you. Jason said he thought
it would be a good idea.
ADAM
Oh, Jason thought it would be a good idea
for me to meet the Cowboy. Should I wear
my ten gallon hat and my six shooters?
CYNTHIA
Something tells me this guy is connected
with what's happening, Adam, and I think
you should do it and I think you should
do it right away.
ADAM
Cynthia...what's going on?
CYNTHIA
It's been a very strange day.
ADAM
And getting stranger. Where do I meet
this Cowboy? I mean do I have to ride
out to the range?
CYNTHIA
Sort of, funny boy. If I tell him the
meeting's on you're to go to the top of
Beachwood Canyon. There's a corral up
there where he'll be.
ADAM
You gotta be kidding?
CYNTHIA
Will you meet with him?
ADAM
Yeah, sure. It is that kind of a day.
When?
CYNTHIA
I'll call him, then call you back...If
you want you could stay at my place.
ADAM
Cynthia... that would not be a good idea.
CYNTHIA
I'm just offering a place to stay.
ADAM
I understand, Cynthia and thank you for
the offer. I'll find a place. Now go
ahead and give the Cowboy a yodel and get
back to me.
CYNTHIA
Okay, but you don't know what you're
missing.
ADAM
Git along little dowgie and call me back.
Adam hangs up and seems to sag, cupping his forehead and eyes
with his hand.
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Scene 25 - The Cowboy's Advice
Adam, in his Porsche, makes his way up the canyon.
INT. PORSCHE
Adam feeling like a fool drives up the dark, winding canyon
road. As he nears the top of the canyon the residential area
gives way to desert brush. The road winds steeply up to a
dark dead end where an old barn and stable sit. Adam parks in
a little dirt lot and walk up past the barn to the corral.
His eyes grow accustomed to the dark and he.looks about. No
one is around. There's only a light wind and a few twinkling
stars in the sky above. Suddenly some bare bulbs hanging from
the corral gate flare up. Adam hears a noise in the
brightness and turns. There walking toward him into the light
is the Cowboy - dressed in clean blue denim jeans, well-oiled
unscuffed, beautifully engraved cowboy boots, a red
embroidered ivory buttoned cowboy shirt complete with string
tie. Atop the Cowboy's head is a 10 X white Stetson. The
Cowboy is smiling warmly as he approaches. He stops in front
of Adam and begins to speak with a true, slow Western drawl.
COWBOY
Howdy!
ADAM
Howdy to you.
COWBOY
Beautiful night.
ADAM
Yeah.
COWBOY
Sure want to thank ya for drivin' all the
way up to see me from that Beverly Hills
Hotel.
ADAM
No problem. What's on your mind?
COWBOY
Well now, here's a man who wants to get
right to it. Kinda anxious to get to it
are ya?
ADAM
Whatever.
COWBOY
A man's attitude ... a man's attitude goes
some ways toward how a man's life will
be. Is that somethin' you agree with?
ADAM
Sure.
COWBOY
Now... did you answer cause you thought
that's what I wanted to hear or did you
think about what I said and answer cause
you truly believe that to be right?
ADAM
I agree with what you said...truly.
COWBOY
What did I say?
ADAM
That a man's attitude determines to a
large extent how his life will be.
COWBOY
So since you agree I guess you could be a
person who does not care about the good
life.
ADAM
How's that?
COWBOY
Well, just stop for a little second and
think about it. Will ya do that for me?
ADAM
Okay, I'm thinking.
COWBOY
No. You're too busy being a smart aleck
to be thinkin'. Now I want ya to think
and quit bein' such a smart aleck. Can ya
do that for me?
ADAM
Look ... where's this going? What do you
want me to do?
COWBOY
There's sometimes a buggy. How many
drivers does a buggy have?
ADAM
One.
COWBOY
So let's just say I'm drivin' this buggy
and you fix your attitude and you can
ride along with me.
ADAM
Okay.
COWBOY
Now I know a few things. I know you have
had a rough day. You're probably thinkin'
I don't know the half of it, but in
actual fact I know every part of it. The
business of gittin' thrown off your
movie, the heartache of seeing your wife
with another man... losin' access to that
precious film vault...
Adam suddenly looks stunned, unsure.
COWBOY (cont'd)
... realizin' you don't have hardly a
nickel to your name and then add on to
that the sickenin' feeling some men are
gonna catch you and hurt you bad for
bustin' their vehicle. Some days are like
that. They are rough, but what will
tomorrow bring? Will it be better than
today? The same ... or worse?
A lot of that is up to us individually.
Up to us and our attitude. When the
Castigliane brothers said "This is no
longer your film," they meant it, but
they didn't mean you were not going to
direct it. I want you to go back to work
tomorrow. You were re-casting the lead
actress anyway ... audition many girls for
the part. When you see the girl that was
shown to you earlier today, you will say
" This is the girl." The rest of the
cast can stay- that is up to you, but
that lead girl is not up to you. Now,
you will see me one more time if you do
good. You will see me two more times if
you do bad. Good night.
The Cowboy turns and walks until he is engulfed in darkness.
Through the darkness Adam hears the sound of a car door
opening and closing, then another opening and closing and
then the sound of the car driving away. Adam walks up in the
direction the Cowboy took, but he sees no sign of a car nor
any dust nor any road. He goes back down past the barn and
stables to his car. There standing by his Porsche is the
Cowboy.
COWBOY (cont'd)
You thinkin' this'll work out, cause I
was thinkin' it just might.
ADAM
It will work out.
COWBOY
Good then, but, just in case, that bank's
gonna stay closed a bit longer. You
understand that?
ADAM
I understand.
COWBOY
You're an understandin' fella.
ADAM
So, this is the last time I see you then
unless I do bad?
COWBOY
No, this one doesn't count. It's part of
the original one. So then ... until we meet
again.
ADAM
Okay.
Adam gets in his car and drives off leaving the Cowboy
smiling behind him.
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Scene 26 - Sisterly Conflict: Rita and
We see the rays of the rising sun falling on the huge letters
of the HOLLYWOOD SIGN and the hills surrounding it.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT. - MORNING
We see Rita's face as we hear Betty off screen.
BETTY
"You're still here?"
RITA
"I came back. I thought that's what you
wanted."
We see Betty.
BETTY
(angrily)
"Nobody wants you here!"
Moving back we realize that the girls are acting out Betty's
audition scene. Rita is reading her lines.
RITA
"Really?"
BETTY
"My parents are right upstairs! They
think you've left..."
RITA
"So... surprise"...
BETTY
"I can call them... I can call my dad... "
RITA
"But you won't..."
BETTY
"You're playing a dangerous game here.
If you're trying to blackmail me... it's
not going to work."
RITA
"You know what I want...it's not that
difficult."
BETTY
(furious)
"Get out! Get out before I call my
dad ... he trusts you ... your his best
friend. This will be the end of
everything... "
RITA
"What about you? What will your dad
think about you?"
BETTY
"Stop! Just Stop! That's what you said
from the beginning. If I tell what
happened... they'll arrest you and put you
in jail, so get out of here before..."
RITA
"Before what?"
Betty pulls a table knife out from behind her back.
BETTY
"Before I kill you."
RITA
"Then they'd put you in jail."
Betty mimes with moving fingers tears flowing from her eyes.
BETTY
Cry, cry, cry, and then I say with big
emotion, "I hate you... I hate us both!"
Betty drops the kitchen knife and both girls start laughing.
BETTY (cont'd)
Such a lame scene.
RITA
But you are really good.
Betty mimes tapping a cigarette in a cigarette holder ala
Dietrich.
BETTY
Thank you dahling!
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Scene 27 - An Awkward Visitor
On the move Coco is just bringing her cigarette in its holder
up to her painted red lips. The phone is ringing and she's
crossing the room to answer it.
COCO
(into phone)
Hello ... Ruthie... How's the great up
north? ... Oh, I'm sorry to hear
it ... what? Well, I haven't seen her if
she's in there. Now, Ruthie there's
nothing to worry about. I saw Betty last
night and she was just fine. Yes, and I
gave them to her. She's a real nice kid,
Ruthie. Now stop worrying, will ya.
I'll go over and have a look around. I
will. I've got the production office
number. I'll find you. Now keep your
socks on up there and take lots of "C."
Goodbye honey.
Coco puts down the receiver with a long sigh.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - DAY
Betty and Rita are sitting on the leather couch having some
coffee. The front door to the apartment is open and sunlight
is pouring in through the screen door. Betty looks at her
watch.
BETTY
Oh, no wonder I'm starving. I'm going to
fix a sandwich. You want one?
RITA
I'm all right.
BETTY
You've got to eat something. You're just
nervous about going over to see if you're
Diane Selwyn.
Rita just looks at her. Betty starts for the kitchen.
BETTY (cont'd)
Suit yourself. I'll share mine with you
if you change your mind.
Betty goes into the kitchen. Suddenly there's a knock on the
screen door and Coco peers in, seeing Rita on the couch.
Rita looks up ... panicked.
COCO
Hi! Who are you?
RITA
Uh...Betty!?
Betty comes out from the kitchen and sees the situation.
COCO
Can I see you outside a minute Betty?
Betty walks past Rita, pats her on the shoulder and goes
outside to see Coco who has moved away to wait.
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Scene 28 - Aunt's Suspicions
The screen door slams. Coco and Betty face each other close,
out of earshot of Rita.
COCO
Your Aunt called me.
BETTY
I was afraid of that.
COCO
She wants to know who's staying in her
apartment.
BETTY
(slowly, deliberately)
It's just for a night or two, until she
finds her own place. I tried to explain
that to Aunt Ruth, but the connection was
bad and her plane was leaving and she got
it all mixed up. I kept telling her it
was my friend and she kept saying she
didn't know any Ritas ...
COCO
Sweetie, look at me straight.
Betty lifts her eyes to Coco's. Direct, clear.
BETTY
Coco...she's very nice. We went to
school together.
COCO
So I guess your Grandpa and Grandma know
her.
BETTY
Not really. I met her in junior college
and she was from this other town.
Coco looks hard into Betty's innocent face.
BETTY (cont'd)
You can call my grandparents ... I'm sure
they'd tell you that I don't lie and I
sure wouldn't allow a stranger to invade
my Aunt Ruth's apartment.
COCO
Honey... I was married to a director for
thirty years. He had an uncanny ability
to read people. Maybe some of it rubbed
off on me or maybe I had it all
along ... you're a good kid... What you're
telling me is a load of horse - pucky but
it comes from a good place. I'll trust
you to sort this out. Now I'm not going
against Ruth. She's got enough to worry
about up there in Canada. If she asks-
I'm going to say everything is okay, and
you make sure it is.
(Coco places her hand on
Betty's shoulder and squeezes
it)
If you need any help you know where to
find me.
Betty puts her hand on Coco's shoulder and gives her a
squeeze.
BETTY
You're really something Coco...thank you.
COCO
Don't make me out to be a sucker. Louise
Bonner says there's trouble in there.
You remember last night. Sometimes she's
wrong, but if there is trouble - get rid
of it.
Coco turns and walks away. Betty studies her and thinks
about what she said before turning and going back inside.
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Scene 29 - Detectives Investigate Phony Credit Cards
Betty enters through the screen door. Rita studies her.
RITA
Is everything all right? Is it bad for
you that I'm here?
BETTY
(slightly forcing a broad
smile)
Everything is A-okay, but I've gotta get
that sandwich!
On her way to the kitchen she checks her watch.
BETTY (cont'd)
And I've got an audition in one hour.
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INT. HOLLYWOOD POLICE STATION - DAY
Detective Neal Domgaard throws two wallets down on the desk
in front of Detective Harry McKnight. Harry pauses in the
middle of a large bite of grilled cheese sandwich with bacon
and tomato. He looks down and studies the wallets.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
(biting in and chewing)
Nice wallets.
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Handstitched Italian. Filled with phony
credit cards ... off the two guys in the
Caddy.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
The one of 'em still alive?
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Yeah... just .... Dr. Scott's got 'im. You
remember Dr.Scott.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Oh yeah.
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Well he said... you know in his way... you
know what I mean? Besides the guy
gettin' rolled up under the kids car
which busted him up pretty bad, there was
this little knife-like torn piece of
metal, you know, off the car body, rolled
out and slid up through this guy's neck
and just kinda slit his aorta, you know,
but they didn't find it right away, so
the guy's losin' a lot of blood, you
know, to the brain - all this time cause
it was just like this thin little
puncture wound on the surface of his neck
that kinda sealed itself, he said, while
inside the aorta is bleedin' pretty
steady all that time. So, Dr. Scott's
laughin' you know like he does 'cause he
knows we want to talk to this guy. He's
laughin' you know and shakin'... Son of a
bitch couldn't stop laughin'... It was
kinda contagious 'cause pretty soon we
were all laughin'...the nurse was
laughin'. You know how he is.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Find out who they are?
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Nope, not yet. Their fingerprints don't
match up anywhere.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
(another big bite - chewing)
Interesting.
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Yeah ... and they both use the same
address.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Where at?
DETECTIVE NEAL DOMGAARD
Palmdale.
DETECTIVE HARRY MCKNIGHT
Damn, that's a long drive.
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Scene 30 - Betty Inquires About The Deal's Facilitator
Betty is coming out of Aunt Ruth's apartment. She calls
back in to Rita.
BETTY
I hope I'm back in a couple of hours.
Don't drink all the coke.
(we hear laughter from inside
and Rita call out.)
RITA
Good luck!
BETTY
When I get back I'll have the cab
waiting, so be ready to go.
RITA
Okay.
Betty closes the door and heads across the courtyard. She
knocks on Coco's door and in a moment Coco answers.
BETTY
Sorry to trouble you, Coco.
COCO
It's all right gorgeous. Something
wrong?
BETTY
No, no. I'm on my way to my audition.
Before I go I wanted to ask you if you
could remember the man's name ... Aunt
Ruthie's friend who helped put this
together. It completely went out of my
mind.
COCO
His name's Wally Brown .... great guy.
Been in the business since forever.
BETTY
Thanks Coco. It'd be so embarrassing
COCO
Naw! He wouldn't have cared. Just give
him a good performance and he'll be happy
and I've got a feeling you'll do just
that.
BETTY
Thanks Coco. I'll let you know.
COCO
Get going. You don't want to be late.
BETTY
Right. See ya.
COCO
Good luck, honey!
Betty takes off through the iron gates and Coco smiles as she
watches her go.
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Scene 31 - Betty Arrives at Paramount Studios
Betty is wide-eyed and filled with awe at something she is
seeing.
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EXT. - PARAMOUNT STUDIOS - MAIN ENTRANCE GATE - DAY
The cab pulls up to the gate. Betty pays the driver and gets
out. She-stands for a moment staring at a dream.
She walks through the gate and as she goes is stopped by a
PARAMOUNT GUARD.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
And where do we think we're going, Miss?
Betty stops and turns.
BETTY
To my audition.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
And who are we auditioning for today?
BETTY
Wally Brown.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
And do we know which of the fifty-seven
buildings Wally Brown is in?
BETTY
(smiling)
No, we don't.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
Well, now we've got to figure that out
first don't we?
BETTY
Yes, Sir.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
Mr.Wallace Brown is in the Executive
Building on the second floor. We want to
go in and turn right at the first street.
Then we want to walk three blocks down
past Stage 17 to the white Executive
Building. Once we're on the second floor
the receptionist will take us from there.
Now do we have name?
BETTY
Betty Elms.
PARAMOUNT GUARD
Let's see if we have a pass for Betty
Elms ... and we do. Here we go. And good
luck Miss. Elms.
BETTY
Thank you... thank you very much.
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Scene 32 - The Audition
Betty finishes climbing some stairs and crosses to the
receptionist. She hands over her pass. The receptionist
looks at it, hands it back to Betty and points down the hall
to her left.
RECEPTIONIST
Number 43, on the left.
BETTY
Thank you.
Betty walks down the long corridor past several offices. The
door to office 43 is open when she arrives and she enters a
large sitting room with a receptionist at a desk off to one
side.
RECEPTIONIST
May I help you?
BETTY
My name is Betty Elms. I'm here to
audition for... Mr. Brown
RECEPTIONIST
Good. Perfect timing. Have a seat and
I'll get Mr. Brown.
The receptionist stands, walks to a door, knocks twice, then
enters.
She closes the door behind her and Betty is alone in the
sitting room. She sits on a couch and looks at the old
movie posters covering all four walls.
In a moment the same door opens again and an elderly,
distinguished looking gentleman WALLY BROWN comes out
smiling. Betty stands up immediately.
WALLY
Betty Elms?
BETTY
Yes.
WALLY
I'm Wally Brown. Your Aunt is a very dear
friend of mine so it's particularly nice
to meet you.
BETTY
Very pleased to meet you.
WALLY
Come in. I'd like you to meet everyone.
As they walk into Wally's office...
WALLY (cont'd)
I took the liberty of inviting an extra
person to see your audition. She saw
your resume picture and was very
interested in meeting you.
Inside Wally's office several people rise out of chairs when
Wally enters with Betty.
WALLY (cont'd)
Betty Elms this is Jack Taft, my
assistant, Jimmy Katz who we've already
cast for the part of "Chuck". He'll be
doing the scene with you.
This is Julie Chadwick and Bob Brooker,
the director, and our surprise guest is
Sarah James. We couldn't afford her to
cast our picture, but as casting agents
go she's the best.
SARAH JAMES
Why thank you, Wally. Hello Betty.
She and Betty shake hands.
BETTY
Pleased to meet you.
SARAH JAMES
This is Nicki, my assistant.
Nicki, a very stylish, thin girl with black cat-eyed glasses
nods coolly to Betty.
WALLY
And this is Martha, Martha Johnson, who
you met out front.
Betty nervously smiles to the room.
BETTY
Hi.
WALLY
Well. Shall we get to it? Would you like
a water or a coffee before we begin?
Betty's hands are beginning to sweat.
BETTY
No, no, I'm fine.
WALLY
Well then, take a seat everyone. Betty
why don't you join Jimmy and we'll play
the scene. Is there anything you'd like
to say Bob... something to Betty before
they begin?
Betty stops on her way across to Jimmy and looks to Bob the
director.
BOB
No ... it's not a contest, see, the two of
them with themselves, so don't play it
for real until it gets real.
Betty doesn't know what to say. She catches Sarah's
assistant, Nicki, rolling her eyes.
BETTY
Okay.
Betty continues walking toward Jimmy who opens his arms to
her as she approaches. He's old enough to be her father.
JIMMY
Just tell me where it hurts, baby.
BETTY
What?
JIMMY
I want to play this one close, Bob. Like
it was with that girl, what's her name,
with the black hair. That felt good.
Whaddya think?
Betty looks from Jimmy to Bob.
BOB
That'd be good, Jimmy. Just don't rush
that line again. I told you... the line
where you say, "Before what?"
JIMMY
I was playin' off 'em. They say,
"They'll arrest you"... and stuff like
that.. "put you in jail"... they say it
like that. They all say it the same way,
so I react like that.
Jimmy turns to Betty.
JIMMY (cont'd)
Look ... what's your name?
BETTY
Betty.
JIMMY
Yeah ... Betty. You don't rush it. I
don't rush it. We play it close, just
like in the movies.
Jimmy reaches out and puts his arm around Betty and brings
her in against his pot belly.
JIMMY (cont'd)
Dad's best friend goes to work.
Jimmy smiles as he brings Betty a little closer. She is
trying to concentrate through the nervousness and Jimmy's
breath. There is a silence as Jimmy looks her in the eyes.
Everyone in the room is looking Betty in the eyes.
WALLY
Bob?
BOB
And ... ACTION!
Betty and Jimmy start the scene. It is very difficult for
Betty as Jimmy has her in an absurd clench now.
BETTY
You're still here?
JIMMY
I came back. I thought that's what you
wanted.
Jimmy plays this with a big lecherous smile. He gives the
last part of the line across her cheek up to her ear.
BETTY
Nobody wants you here.
Betty uses the anger of this line to push herself away from
Jimmy. Jimmy reaches out and grabs her wrist.
JIMMY
Really?
Betty pulls her hand away and stands her ground.
BETTY
My parents are right upstairs! They
think you've left.
Jimmy smiles broadly and moves again toward Betty.
JIMMY
So ... surprise!
Betty pushes him back.
BETTY
I can call them... I can call my dad.
JIMMY
But you won't.
He grabs Betty by the wrist again and pulls her in to him.
He puts his hand on her waist and it accidently slips and
keeps going down her hips. He jerks his hand back. Betty
looks down and sees Jimmy's hand hovering above her thigh.
Betty takes her hand and gently presses down on Jimmy's hand.
She slowly looks up with the most seductive smile. Jimmy
lets his hand rest more firmly on her thigh, and squeezes her
thigh as he sees her smile. With his other hand Jimmy gently
pulls her closer. Something has started coming over Betty
and she catches the drift of this scene in a different way.
She's surprising herself.
BETTY
(almost a hot whisper)
You're playing a dangerous game here. if
you're trying to blackmail me... it's not
going to work.
Jimmy now surprises himself. He becomes almost tender and
genuinely worked up from the heat coming off Betty.
JIMMY
You know what I want...it's not that
difficult.
Where the scene should turn to anger from Betty it can't now
and Betty plays it as she feels it. She stays in very close
to Jimmy - looking him right in the eyes.
BETTY
(whispering desperately -
slowly)
Get out... Get out before I call my dad.
He trusts you... you're his best friend.
(her arms go around him)
This will be the end of everything.
Jimmy gets lost. He doesn't know where he is anymore. He
can only see Betty's eyes.
JIMMY
What about you? What will your dad think
about you?
Betty still playing it in a dreamy whisper... lost in heat.
BETTY
Stop... just stop! That's what you said
from the beginning. If I tell what
happened... they'll arrest you and put
you in jail, so get out of here before...
JIMMY
(caught by her transfixing,
sultry eyes, and almost
breathless ... he finds himself
taking an extra long pause)
Before what?
As scripted Betty pretends to pull the knife from behind her
back, but wraps the knife around behind Jimmy and pulls him
into a kiss.
BETTY
(as she kisses him - whispers)
Before I kill you.
Jimmy panics and pushes Betty away with his hands on her
shoulders as if forcing himself to come out of a trance. He
finally is able to say his line.
JIMMY
Then they'd put you in jail.
As scripted Betty is supposed to cry now and it is very easy
for her to do this because she's ashamed at how the sex of
the scene took her over. Tears begin running down her
cheeks. She backs away.
BETTY
I hate you... I hate us both!
She pretends to drop the knife. The scene ends.
Everyone in the room has become mesmerized by Betty, but they
soon drift back to reality and begin applauding the
performance. Sarah turns to Nicki.
SARAH JAMES
I'm going to take her over there.
NICKI
Big time!
WALLY
(to everyone)
Wow!
Betty wipes her eyes and turns smiling - still shocked at
herself.
BETTY
Well, there it was.
JIMMY
There it was it was! Baby, you got a
way!
WALLY
Bob?
BOB
Very good. Really. I mean it was forced
maybe but still humanistic. Yeah, very
good, really.
WALLY
Well, thank you Betty, and I mean that.
That was very impressive. You've done
your Aunt proud and I'm going to tell her
the first chance I get. We'll speak again
soon I'm sure, and thank you so much for
coming in.
BETTY
Well, thank you.
Betty doesn't quite know what to do. She moves to the center
of the room and just stands. Remnants of the scene still
staying with her.
Sarah stands and Nicki stands just after.
SARAH JAMES
Thank you, Wally. I'm sure you all have a
lot to talk about. We'll walk Betty out.
WALLY
Well, yes indeed. Our pleasure, Sarah,
and don't you be a stranger. We'd love to
see you around here again real soon.
SARAH JAMES
Well come along, Betty.
Sarah takes Betty's hand and they go to the door. Betty turns
back once more and smiles.
BETTY
Thank you again, Mr. Brown. It was nice
meeting all of you.
Everyone nods and waves and Betty is taken out by Sarah and
Nicki.
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Scene 33 - Dispute in the Corridor
The three of them walk down the corridor.
SARAH JAMES
Oh God, that was awful!
Betty's head spins to Sarah. A look of shock and let down on
her face.
SARAH JAMES (cont'd)
Oh, not you Betty. You were stellar and
I mean that, but poor Wally. He'll never
get that picture made. Wally's days were
up twenty -years ago.
NICKI
(sickening little laugh)
How about that Jimmy Katz?
SARAH JAMES
Oh god! Jimmy Katz never had a day.
Jimmy Katz never had a minute. Poor
Wally.
Betty finds herself getting a little upset.
BETTY
They seem very nice to me, and
Wally... Mr. Brown is a very close friend
of my Aunt's, so. . .
SARAH JAMES
Settle down, Betty. Don't get me wrong.
I love Wally. I ought to. I was married
to him for ten years.
Betty does another shocked head turn.
SARAH JAMES (cont'd)
And I love actors, all actors, Jimmy Katz
included. We just get a little catty
sometimes. Now we want to take you across
the way and introduce you to a director
who's a head above the rest. He's got a
project that you would kill!
At the word 'kill' Betty turns to her once again with a
questioning look.
SARAH JAMES (cont'd)
... Knock it right out of the park.
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Scene 34 - Casting Call
We see what looks like a recording studio right out of the
1960's. We're looking through a plate of glass. A blonde
girl is standing at a vintage microphone. Behind her are
three back-up male vocalists dressed in three tone, shiny
60's suits. We hear strings soar up and the blonde girl
begins to sing SIXTEEN REASONS by Connie Stevens. The male
vocalists backing her up flawlessly.
We move back and realize we are on a movie set inside a sound
stage. A screen test is being shot of the girl and as we
continue moving back we see the director Adam Kesher
surrounded by his crew. Behind them there are many people
standing, eating, watching, working. The stage is full and
bustling. The song plays loudly over. Sarah and Nicki bring
Betty into this scene through a giant stage door. A guard
mimes for them to be quiet as they approach the set. The
song continues to play over.
As Sarah leads Betty up close Adam turns and his eyes fall on
the beautiful face of Betty Elms. Sensing something Betty
turns and sees Adam. They each seem to feel the thrill of
the thunderbolt, but each embarrassed to stare longer than
they already have turn back and watch the girl finish the
song.
ADAM
(calling out through an
electronic megaphone)
Cut it!
He gets out of his chair and walks into the set - up to the
blonde girl. He shakes her hand.
ADAM (cont'd)
Thank you very much, Carol. It was really
great of you to come in. I know how busy
you are.
CAROL
Oh, man, are you kidding? I love this
script! Where do I sign?
ADAM
Look... I love you, but there's no way
they're gonna let me cast this thing
until I've seen everyone. I'll let you
know as soon as I can.
CAROL
I know you will ... cause my manager's
gonna bug you day and night ... me too.
ADAM
It'll be my pleasure. Now, get out of
here.
CAROL
Oh, you're just so cruel... don't forget
me. I'm the girl that's going to play
this part.
ADAM
(lightly pinching her cheek)
See ya later.
Adam turns and goes back out of the set onto the stage floor.
He looks around. He sees Betty being introduced by Sarah to
some of the studio executives. He goes over to his Assistant
Director and looks down at the man's notepad.
ADAM (cont'd)
Who's next, Hank?
HANK
Camilla Rhodes.
Adam wonders - worries.
ADAM
Is she ready?
HANK
All ready.
ADAM
Bring her out.
Hank speaks into his walkie-talkie headset. The sound of his
voice can be heard in several locations throughout the stage.
HANK
(through walkie-talkie)
Camilla Rhodes next!
Adam looks up - a beautiful blonde steps into the set in
front of the microphone. IT IS THE GIRL! The back-up
singers step in behind her.
Adam nods to Hank.
HANK (cont'd)
Turn over!
The cameraman calls out, "Speed".
ADAM
(through megaphone)
Playback!
Countdown before the music begins.
ADAM (cont'd)
ACTION!
The strings soar up and Camilla Rhodes begins to sing.
On the set Betty hears the song again and turns and watches.
Once again her eyes find Adam as his eyes are finding hers.
This time Adam turns away. He watches Camilla for a moment.
She is passable, but not spectacular. Adam reaches out and
pulls Hank over to him.
HANK
Yeah?
Adam pauses.
ADAM
Get Jason over here.
Hank gets on his walkie-talkie.
HANK
Cindy ... Adam wants to see Jason.
Adam continues to watch Camilla Rhodes sing. JASON GOLDWYN,
a tall sixty year old silver-haired man, comes through the
crowd and stops at Adam's side. He looks down at Adam, but
Adam continues watching Camilla Rhodes. Jason follows Adam's
gaze and he watches Camilla sing then turns back to Adam.
Adam slowly looks up right into Jason's eyes - wondering how
much Jason knows, but Jason's face doesn't give away a thing.
JASON
Did you want to tell me something, Adam?
ADAM
This is the girl!
At that moment Ray, having overheard, comes to Jason's side.
He smiles at Adam.
RAY
Excellent choice, Adam.
Adam is sick with himself.
Across the room Betty panics when she looks at her watch.
BETTY
Oh ... oh...I have to be somewhere. I
promised a friend.
She quickly shakes Sarah's and Nicki's hands saying, "I'm
sorry, I'm sorry" and runs off like Cinderella.
Adam turns and sees her running off out of his world.
Chris Isaak's song "Except The New Girl" segues in over
Connie Stevens and plays as Adam, Sarah and Nicki watch Betty
disappear out the sound stage door.
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Scene 35 - A Chance Encounter
Chris Isaak song "Except The New Girl" continues.
An idling cab sits waiting with back door open.
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COURTYARD - 1612 HAVENHURST DAY
Chris Isaak song segues to the sounds of a blues saxophone.
Betty and Rita come out of Aunt Ruth's apartment. Betty is
laughing, pulling on Rita.
BETTY
C'mom. There's nothing to be afraid of.
Across the courtyard CORNELL DUMONT, a strikingly handsome
young black musician, is on his balcony playing the
saxophone. He stops playing when he sees the girls. He
stands and looks as if recognizing someone.
CORNELL DUMONT
Hey!
Betty and Rita stop and look up, shielding their eyes from
the sun.
CORNELL DUMONT (cont'd)
Hey, how's Sol?
BETTY
Sol?
CORNELL DUMONT
No ... not you...
(to Rita)
I'm sorry... I forget your name.
RITA
(almost inaudible)
Rita.
CORNELL DUMONT
Yeah. Well, I haven't seen Sol lately.
Tell him to come by the club.
Rita nods ... biting her lip. Cornell smiles and picks up his
sax.
BETTY
And what's your name?
CORNELL DUMONT
(big smile)
Cornell Dumont.
He begins to blow some sweet jazz that flows smooth as syrup.
BETTY
(whispering)
Ask him who Sol is ...
Rita hurriedly starts for the gate.
BETTY (cont'd)
Maybe he could help...
Betty follows Rita through the gate to the waiting cab. They
get in and the cab pulls away.
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Scene 36 - Suspicious Encounter
Betty reaches and gently grabs Rita's shoulder. She speaks
firmly but quietly so the cab driver won't hear.
BETTY
Why didn't you ask him? Sol knows you!
RITA
(whispering back)
But I don't know, Sol. I never heard of
Sol. I'd just get in trouble. That's why
we shouldn't go see about Diane
Selwyn... it's better not to get in
trouble.
BETTY
You're not going to get in trouble.
You're going to find out who you are.
Finding out who you are gets you out of
trouble.
Rita thinks about this silently then begins to worry and
doubt all over again.
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INT. CAB - LATER
Betty holds the slip of paper with the address in her hand.
She turns back and forth watching the buildings on both sides
of the street.
BETTY
It should be around here...
Rita watches out of the window pensively as the cab moves up
Sierra Bonita. They near a modern apartment compound of
bungalows and duplexes almost hidden in the trees and
vegetation. A smooth stucco wall surrounds the complex.
BETTY (cont'd)
(points)
That's it ... 2590.
(nudging Rita)
Does it look familiar?
Rita shakes her head..no. Rita is looking at a black car
parked down the street facing 2590. She discerns two men
sitting in the front.
RITA
Don't stop!
BETTY
What is it? What do you see?!
RITA
(quietly - frantic)
Those men in front, in the car.
BETTY
Do you know them?!
RITA
No... but...
BETTY
(to driver)
Keep going. Go around to the back.
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Scene 37 - Seeking Diane at Sierra Bonita
Betty gets Rita out of the cab and pays the driver, who then
drives away. The girls go through a rear gate and enter the
complex walking along a curving concrete walk. This leads
them to an intersection where a registry is printed on a
rough hewn wooden plaque. They scan the list.
BETTY
Selwyn ... number 12.
They both look around the various doors near them. Betty
spots a sign which says, behind an arrow, bungalows #10
through #20.
BETTY (cont'd)
It's this way.
They set off down another sidewalk toward Bungalow #12. As
they near it and actually can see it just ahead they pass a
chainlink service gate to the alley. Standing in the alley is
a man in a dark suit wearing sunglasses.
Both girls dive for the bushes.
The man in the black suit turns reacting to the noise and
motion. Both girls are trying to catch their breath and stay
as still and quiet as possible.
BETTY (cont'd)
(panting whisper)
Now, you've got me scared.
Peering through the bushes they see the man still looking in
their direction. Suddenly he turns and smiles at something
to his left.
He hurries off, but soon returns carrying two heavy
suitcases, followed by an older woman in a yellow dress.
Both Betty and Rita crawl further forward. They see the limo
and realize that the man they were afraid of is an ordinary
limousine driver just going about his work. The girls stand
up, relieved and a little embarrassed.
BETTY (cont'd)
See, I told you there was nothing to be
afraid of!
They go up to Bungalow #12 and stand for a moment facing the
front door.
RITA
Oh no ... don't.
Betty doesn't listen to Rita. She knocks strongly on the
door. They stand waiting. There's no answer so Betty knocks
again harder. They wait.
RITA (cont'd)
No one's ...
Suddenly the door opens. An attractive MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN
stands before them.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN
Yes?
BETTY
Diane?
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN
Number 17.
BETTY
But it said #12.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN
I switched apartments with her. She's in
#17. Just walk down that way. It's just
to the right.
The woman seems to be looking now at Rita.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN (cont'd)
It's kind of hidden by the foliage.
Betty and Rita start to leave.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN (cont'd)
She hasn't been around for a few days ...
BETTY
Well ... we'll leave her a note.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN
(starting toward them)
I'll go with you. She's still got some of
my stuff.
The phone rings from inside her bungalow.
MIDDLE-AGED WOMAN (cont'd)
(turning back)
Oh ... go ahead. I've got to get that.
The woman hurries back inside and closes the door. Betty and
Rita quickly move up the walkway toward Bungalow #17.
BETTY
I guess you're not Diane.
Rita, still fighting her fear doesn't answer.
They reach Bungalow #17. It's set back beneath tall bushes
and an old Eucalyptus tree. The front door is in deep shadow.
Without even looking at Rita Betty knocks quickly. There's no
answer. She knocks again.
BETTY (cont'd)
Still not home I guess.
The girls drift off to the side of the bungalow. Betty tries
to see in the windows. She tries a window and to her surprise
it opens.
RITA
I don't think...
BETTY
(looking around for anyone
watching)
C'mon help me in. I'll open the front
door.
RITA
No.
Betty jumps up and catches her knees on the siding, her head
through the open window.
BETTY
PUSH!!!
Rita reluctantly pushes and Betty is in. As she closes the
window ...
BETTY (cont'd)
Meet you at the door.
Rita walks around to the front door and gets there just as
Betty opens it. Betty has her hand over her mouth and nose.
BETTY (cont'd)
I don't know if you want to come in here
or not. There's some kind of horrible
smell like... something...
Rita is compelled to go in and as the door clicks shut she
reacts to the smell.
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Scene 38 - Deadly Discovery
Betty begins to go through the bungalow and Rita follows.
All the blinds are closed and the curtains drawn. They move
slowly, looking around at everything as they go. Betty looks
to Rita to see if any of this is something she remembers.
Rita looks as though she's walking in a trance. Through the
half light they move deeper into the bungalow to a corridor.
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EXT. SIERRA BONITA APARTMENTS - BUNGALOW #12 - DAY
The Middle-Aged Woman is just shutting the door to her
bungalow. She walks quickly in the direction of Bungalow
#17.
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INT. - BUNGALOW #17 - DAY
Betty and Rita are moving down the corridor. They pass a
small room and look in at a couch, wardrobe and make-up
table. They move on down the corridor to a door which is
almost closed. Betty touches the door and it seems to swing
open on its own. They enter the room and stop cold. A scream
starts to build inside Rita. Before them is a dead woman
lying on a bed. Great chunks of mattress are standing upright
having been ripped and torn by shotgun blasts. A dried sea of
blood surrounds the bloated, gray body of the woman. The
scream comes out of Rita as a force propelling her to look
closer. Betty lunges after Rita, her eyes also not able to
leave the sight. She covers Rita's mouth with her hand and
brings her close. The scream is stifled by Betty's hand.
In the silence that follows, knocking can be heard. Betty
freezes and keeps Rita quiet with her hand still placed over
her mouth, but she can't stop Rita's violent shaking nor the
horror in her eyes.
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Scene 39 - Betty Calms Rita
The Middle-Aged Woman backs away from the front door, looking
around at bungalow #17. She's not sure if she has heard
something or not. She wonders, then turns and goes back to
her bungalow.
Just as she has disappeared the door to Bungalow #17 flies
open and Rita, followed closely behind by Betty, runs with a
look of horror directly toward us until her tortured face
fills the screen.
Sounds, churning music.
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INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - BATHROOM - DAY
Sounds, music churning continues.
Great sobs, almost hysterical, wrack Rita's body as she bends
over the sink, scissoring into her long, dark hair with a
frenzy. There is a loud sound of the scissors cutting deep
through many strands of hair. Betty's is rushing to her -
her hands reach tenderly, but firmly for Rita's hand holding
the scissors. She keeps her from cutting and moves closer,
whispering in Rita's ear. Rita can't stop crying, but lets
Betty hold her. Music changes ...
BETTY
Rita... I know what you're doing.
RITA
(through uncontrollable sobs)
What ... I..HAVE... to do.
BETTY
I know what you have to do, but let me do
it.
Rita turns and looks up at Betty, her eyes red with crying.
Betty pulls her up facing her. Rita lets Betty take the
scissors. They look into each other's eyes. Betty gently
strokes Rita's cheek, wiping away some tears.
BETTY (cont'd)
Let me do it.
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Scene 40 - An Uncanny Reflection
Panning slowly across we see on the bathroom counter various
open bottles, used Q-tips, towels, combs, a brush, a bowl,
and lots of long strands of cut black hair. We continue
moving up to an empty mirror and eerie music builds. The
reflection of the new Rita moves into the mirror. She has
short, beautiful blonde hair, blonde eyebrows and no make-up.
Betty's reflection comes in beside Rita's. They stare at the
new Rita in the mirror.
BETTY
(quietly with assurance)
You look like someone else.
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EXT. COURTYARD 1612 HAVENHURST - LATE EVENING - ALMOST
DARK
We move off the door of Aunt Ruth's apartment and crane
slowly up to the apartment above hers - WILKINS - the one
with the wayward dog. We move closer to Wilkins' apartment
and as we move in we hear a phone ringing.
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INT. WILKINS' APARTMENT - A MOMENT LATER
Wilkins still in his pajamas, bathrobe and slippers from
morning slouches in an enormous stuffed chair and matching
ottoman, surrounded by piles of papers and coffee cups. His
Jack Russell Terrier wakes and stands at the sound of the
phone ringing on a side table next to Wilkins. Wilkins comes
out of a deep thought and picks up the receiver as he runs
his hand through strange, matted tufts of dirty blonde hair.
WILKINS
Hello. Adam. How's it going? No, it's
okay. Yeah, I'm working, but... they
wanted this script a week ago. What?
What's wrong with your house? The
poolman? Sure, you can have the couch.
No, it's no problem..it's just I
gotta ... I gotta work. Any chance you
could bring some food. No, I got plenty
of money - I just haven't gone out for
awhile. Groovy man!
WILKINS (cont'd)
Murphy and I'll be glad to see you. No,
no, no, he's got plenty of food.
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Scene 41 - A Helping Hand
Rita has just taken the hatbox from the closet shelf and is
setting it on the bed.
BETTY
What are you doing?
Betty is sitting on the bed opposite. Rita opens the hatbox
and removes her purse. She opens the purse and takes out the
money. She sits down on the bed and while staring at the
money she thinks of what to say.
RITA
You've been so good to me ... now we know
why ... why I was so afraid. We know what
kind of trouble I'm in. I shouldn't...
ask you... I only have this to offer.
I'll give you this if I can stay here for
awhile. I don't know what else to do.
Betty moves across the bed to the side of Rita. She puts her
arm around Rita and holds her.
BETTY
Rita... I want you to stay here and you
don't have to give me that money.
RITA
But I want to.
BETTY
No. We shouldn't touch that money. We
don't know about that money. That might
be dangerous money. You have to start all
over again. You look like a brand new
person and you can be a brand new
person... whoever you want to be.
RITA
It sounds kind of nice ... being somebody
brand new.
BETTY
Hey, let's introduce the brand new you to
Hollywood. We haven't seen the roof
garden yet.
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Scene 42 - Betty and Rita Arrive in Hollywood
The girls come out the front door ... Betty leading and pulling
a much happier Rita along with her. They half run across the
courtyard to stone steps under an Ivy covered eave.
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EXT. ROOF GARDEN - NIGHT
The girls race up the stone steps toward us. Soon their wind-
blown, smiling faces fill the screen as they look out. There
before them are the lights of Hollywood with silhouetted
palms, slow-moving theater kleig lights, and floating above
it all the giant sign in the hills reading HOLLYWOOD.
BETTY
Here I am Hollywood! My name's Betty.
A pause.
BETTY (cont'd)
(to Rita)
Say it!
RITA
Here I am Hollywood! My name is ... Rita.
They look out, maybe waiting for an answer blowing in the
Santa Ana wind.
CUT TO:
INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - NIGHT - A MOMENT LATER
We move in to the pile of money next to Rita's purse. Past
that we move down inside Rita's purse. We see the Blue Key
and move closer to it until it fills the screen.
CUT TO:
EXT. DENNY'S RESTAURANT - HOLLYWOOD - NIGHT
We drift along the red bricks past the payphone, along the
wall until we come to the corner. Slowly we round the corner
and move to a dark alley. There amongst the dumpsters and
trash cans is the dark silhouette of a figure. We move closer
to the figure. It is the bum and the bum sits. We move
closer and the bum's face fills the screen. It's face is
black with fungus. It's eyes turn and they seem to be red.
THE END
Ratings
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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betty | Betty's character arc in the screenplay is one of growth and self-discovery. She learns to navigate the challenges of the entertainment industry while staying true to herself. She also develops a strong bond with Rita, a mysterious woman who helps her to see the world in a new light. | Betty's character arc is well-developed and believable. However, there are a few areas where it could be improved. For example, Betty's decision to threaten Rita with a knife in one scene seems out of character. Additionally, her relationship with Rita could be explored in more depth. | Here are a few suggestions for improving Betty's character arc: * Explore Betty's motivations for threatening Rita with a knife in more depth. What is she afraid of? What does she want from Rita? * Develop Betty's relationship with Rita in more depth. What do they learn from each other? How do they help each other to grow? * Give Betty a more明確なgoal. What does she want to achieve in Hollywood? What is she willing to do to achieve it? |
rita | **Act 1:** Rita is introduced as a mysterious and troubled woman who wakes up with amnesia. She is withdrawn, standoffish, and desperate, searching for her identity. Her confusion and desperation are conveyed through her dialogue, as she frequently expresses her lack of memory and confusion. **Act 2:** As Rita slowly regains her memory, she becomes more open and curious about her past. She is guarded about her past and reluctant to reveal too much, but she gradually starts to trust Betty and share more about herself. Her speaking style becomes less hesitant and more confident as she begins to piece together her identity. **Act 3:** Rita discovers the truth about her past and the accident that caused her amnesia. She is deeply affected by this revelation and experiences a moment of intense fear and shock. Her speaking style becomes more frantic and panicked as she tries to process this new information. **Act 4:** Rita is determined to move on from her past and start a new life. She is grateful for Betty's support and offers her money as a gesture of appreciation. Her speaking style is hesitant and filled with uncertainty, reflecting her fear and desire for safety. | Rita's character arc is well-developed and believable. She undergoes a significant transformation throughout the screenplay, from a mysterious and lost woman to a determined and hopeful individual. Her arc is closely tied to the main plot of the film and provides a strong emotional core for the story. One potential criticism of Rita's arc is that it may be somewhat predictable. Audiences may guess early on that Rita is hiding something and that she will eventually regain her memory. However, the screenplay does a good job of keeping the audience engaged and invested in Rita's journey. | One way to improve Rita's character arc would be to add more depth to her motivations. Why is she so desperate to regain her memory? What is she afraid of? Exploring these questions in more detail would help to make Rita a more well-rounded and sympathetic character. Another suggestion would be to add more conflict to Rita's arc. She faces some challenges in the screenplay, but she is able to overcome them relatively easily. Adding more obstacles to her path would help to create more tension and suspense in the story. |
adam | Adam's character arc follows a journey of transformation from a passionate and determined director to a frustrated and betrayed husband, and finally to a desperate and conflicted character facing financial ruin and personal turmoil. Through these challenges, he experiences a range of emotions, including anger, frustration, and desperation. He is forced to confront his own limitations and vulnerabilities, and ultimately becomes more open to change. | While Adam's character arc is well-developed and believable, it could be strengthened by providing more context for his motivations and actions. For example, exploring the reasons behind his confrontational nature and his initial resistance to change would add depth to his character. Additionally, the screenplay could benefit from providing a clearer resolution to Adam's conflicts, giving the audience a sense of closure. | To improve Adam's character arc, the screenplay could include scenes that delve deeper into his backstory and motivations. This could include exploring his relationship with his parents, his childhood experiences, and his reasons for becoming a filmmaker. Additionally, the screenplay could provide a more definitive resolution to Adam's conflicts, such as having him confront his wife and address the issues in their marriage, or finding a way to resolve his financial problems. This would give the audience a sense of closure and leave them with a better understanding of Adam's character. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Scene Length and Emotional Impact | Generally the longer scenes have a higher average emotional impact. Scenes 5, 20 and 37 are exceptions to this. |
Suspense and Emotional Impact | Scenes with high suspense tend to also have high emotional impact. Scene 37 is an exception to this, having high suspense but low emotional impact. |
Dialogue and Emotional Impact | Scenes with high dialogue tend to also have high emotional impact. Scenes 5 and 40 are exceptions to this, having high emotional impact with low dialogue. |
Character Changes and Emotional Impact | Scenes with character changes tend to have a higher emotional impact. Scene 32 is an exception to this, having high emotional impact but no character changes. |
Characterization and Emotional Impact | Scenes with high characterization tend to also have high emotional impact. Scene 3 is an exception to this, having high characterization with low emotional impact. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The writer demonstrates a solid foundation in storytelling and screenwriting techniques. Their ability to create atmosphere, tension, and engaging characters is evident throughout the analyzed scenes. However, there are areas that can benefit from further development to enhance the overall impact and quality of their writing.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | Story by Robert McKee | This comprehensive book provides in-depth insights into the craft of storytelling, character development, and scene construction, addressing key areas for improvement identified in the scene analyses. |
Video | MasterClass: Aaron Sorkin Teaches Screenwriting | Renowned screenwriter Aaron Sorkin offers valuable lessons on dialogue writing, characterization, and the overall craft of screenwriting, particularly relevant to areas where the writer's skills can be further developed. |
Exercise | Write a scene with a character facing an internal conflict that drives their actions.Practice In SceneProv | Practicing this exercise will help the writer explore deeper character motivations and create more compelling and relatable characters. |
Exercise | Write a scene with only dialogue, focusing on revealing character through conversation.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will refine the writer's ability to craft natural and engaging dialogue that advances the story and develops characters. |
Exercise | Write a scene that starts in the middle of an action sequence, then reveals the events leading up to it through flashbacks or exposition.Practice In SceneProv | Practicing this exercise will enhance the writer's skills in structuring scenes for maximum impact and building suspense or intrigue. |
Stories Similar to this one
Story | Explanation |
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Blue Velvet | Both stories involve a mysterious woman with amnesia, a dark underworld, and a sense of surrealism. |
Lost Highway | Both stories involve a man who loses his identity and becomes involved in a strange and dangerous world. |
Mulholland Drive | Both stories involve a woman who comes to Los Angeles and becomes involved in a strange and dangerous world. |
Twin Peaks | Both stories involve a small town with a dark secret and a sense of surrealism. |
Sunset Boulevard | Both stories involve an aging starlet and a young man who becomes involved in her life. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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Car Crash | The film opens with a car crash involving a black Cadillac limousine, killing the driver and another man, and leaving a young woman dazed and confused. | A car crash is a plot device that can be used to create conflict, introduce new characters, or set the stage for a larger story. It is a common trope in thrillers, action movies, and dramas. |
Amnesia | The young woman who survived the car crash has amnesia and struggles to regain her memory. | Amnesia is a trope that can be used to create a sense of mystery and intrigue. It can also be used to explore the themes of identity and self-discovery. |
Doppelgänger | The young woman sees a reflection of herself in the bathroom mirror that looks like a different person. | A doppelgänger is a character who is a double or exact copy of another character. This trope is often used to create a sense of mystery and suspense. |
The Cowboy | The Cowboy is a mysterious figure who appears to Adam and offers him guidance. | The Cowboy is a common figure in Western films and TV shows. He is often a mentor or guide to the protagonist. |
Casting Couch | Betty attends an audition for a film and is subjected to inappropriate behavior by the casting director. | The casting couch is a trope that refers to the practice of sexual harassment or assault by those in power in the entertainment industry. |
Murder Mystery | The young woman and her friend investigate a murder and uncover a web of secrets. | A murder mystery is a story that involves the investigation of a murder. This trope is often used in crime dramas and mystery novels. |
Rooftop Scene | The young woman and her friend share a revealing conversation on a rooftop. | A rooftop scene is a trope that often occurs in romantic dramas and coming-of-age films. It is a place where characters can escape from the pressures of everyday life and share their deepest thoughts. |
The Mysterious Neighbor | A mysterious woman moves into the young woman's apartment building and becomes a source of fascination and intrigue. | |
The Missing Person | Rita, the young woman who survived the car accident, has a key that may hold clues to her missing memories. | The missing person is a trope that is often used to create a sense of mystery and suspense. This character is often loved and mourned by the protagonist, and their disappearance can have a profound impact on the story. |
The Power of Suggestion | Rita's hair transforms into blonde after Betty convinces her to change her appearance. | The power of suggestion is a trope that refers to the ability of one person to influence the thoughts and actions of another person through suggestion. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Identity and Memory | The screenplay explores the theme of identity and memory through the character of Rita, who suffers from amnesia and struggles to remember her true identity. This theme is also reflected in Betty's journey to become an actress and find her place in Hollywood. | Identity and memory are central themes in the screenplay, as the characters grapple with their own sense of self and the memories that shape their lives. | ||||||||||||
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Dreams and Reality | The screenplay blurs the lines between dreams and reality, with characters experiencing surreal and dreamlike sequences. This theme is evident in Dan's unsettling dreams, Betty's encounter with the mysterious dark-haired woman in her apartment, and the overall narrative structure of the screenplay. | Dreams and reality are intertwined in the screenplay, challenging the audience's perception of what is real and what is imagined. | ||||||||||||
Hollywood and the Entertainment Industry | The screenplay explores the dark underbelly of Hollywood and the entertainment industry, depicting the struggles, manipulation, and corruption that exist behind the glamorous facade. This theme is evident in the auditions, casting decisions, and power dynamics between the characters. | The theme of Hollywood and the entertainment industry sheds light on the harsh realities and hidden truths that exist within the glamorous world of show business. | ||||||||||||
Mystery and Intrigue | The screenplay is filled with mystery and intrigue, as the characters navigate through a web of secrets, hidden identities, and unexpected events. This theme is evident in the car accident, the discovery of the dead woman in the apartment, and the mysterious blue key. | Mystery and intrigue drive the narrative of the screenplay, keeping the audience engaged and guessing about the true nature of the events unfolding. | ||||||||||||
Power and Control | The theme of power and control is explored through the manipulation and dominance exerted by certain characters. This theme is evident in the interactions between the Castigliane brothers and Adam, as well as the control exerted by the mysterious figures in the screenplay. | Power and control play a significant role in the screenplay, highlighting the lengths some characters will go to maintain their power and influence over others. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by its dark, suspenseful, and dreamlike atmosphere, with a focus on psychological depth and the exploration of the human psyche. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a sense of intrigue and mystery, drawing the reader into the story's complex and often disturbing world. |
Best Representation Scene | 1 - Tragic Crash on Mulholland Drive |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation of the writer's voice because it perfectly encapsulates the dark, suspenseful, and dreamlike atmosphere that permeates the entire script. The vivid imagery and psychological depth of this scene draw the reader in and create a sense of intrigue and mystery that keeps them on the edge of their seat. |
- Overall originality score: 7
- Overall originality explanation: The screenplay demonstrates a blend of familiar and fresh approaches, with a noteworthy level of originality in certain scenes.
- Most unique situations: - A woman observing suspicious activity and following the perpetrators discreetly - Betty and Rita's surreal and unsettling experience in the bungalow, discovering a dead body and witnessing Rita's sudden hair-cutting in distress - Rita's mysterious transformation in the mirror, with blonde hair and no makeup, adding an air of unease
- Overall unpredictability score: 7
- Overall unpredictability explanation: The screenplay offers a balance of predictable elements, such as a young actress pursuing success in Hollywood, and unpredictable twists and turns that keep the audience engaged, such as the mysterious car crash, the discovery of the dead body, and the enigmatic character of the Cowboy.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals in the screenplay revolve around her need for safety, survival, understanding, and identity. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals in the screenplay involve escaping danger, finding safety, uncovering the truth, helping others, and achieving success in the film industry. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict in the screenplay is between the protagonist's desire for truth, identity, and justice, and the chaotic, deceptive, and manipulative nature of the film industry and Hollywood. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal goals and conflicts contribute to her development by forcing her to confront her fears, navigate complex relationships and power dynamics, and ultimately discover her own identity and truth amidst the illusionary world of Hollywood.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The protagonist's evolving internal and external goals provide the backbone for the narrative structure, creating suspense, mystery, and character growth as she navigates through various obstacles and challenges on her journey.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The goals and conflicts in the screenplay explore themes of identity, authenticity, truth, corruption, and the often deceptive and manipulative nature of the film industry. These themes deepen the narrative and offer commentary on the human desire for connection, success, and the search for personal truth in a complex and illusionary world.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
- Physical environment: The physical environment of the screenplay is a combination of urban and suburban settings, with a focus on Hollywood and Los Angeles. The screenplay often uses the physical environment to create a sense of mystery and danger, such as the dark and winding roads of Mulholland Drive and the desolate alleyways of Hollywood. The physical environment also reflects the characters' inner lives, such as the cramped and cluttered apartment that Betty shares with Rita.
- Culture: The screenplay is set in the world of Hollywood, and it explores the themes of fame, ambition, and the dark side of the entertainment industry. The screenplay also explores the theme of identity, as many of the characters are struggling to find their place in the world. The screenplay also explores the theme of relationships, as many of the characters are struggling to form and maintain meaningful connections with others.
- Society: The screenplay depicts a society that is obsessed with fame and fortune. The characters are constantly trying to climb the social ladder, and they are willing to do whatever it takes to achieve their goals. The screenplay also depicts a society that is very superficial, as the characters are more concerned with appearances than they are with substance.
- Technology: The screenplay uses technology in a variety of ways. For example, the screenplay uses cell phones to track the characters' movements and to eavesdrop on their conversations. The screenplay also uses computers to create simulations of the characters' memories. The screenplay also uses technology to create a sense of surveillance, as the characters are constantly being watched by cameras and security systems.
- Characters influence: The physical environment, culture, and society depicted in the screenplay have a significant influence on the characters' experiences and actions. For example, the dark and winding roads of Mulholland Drive create a sense of mystery and danger that leads the characters to make risky decisions. The world elements also contribute to the characters' inner lives, such as the cramped and cluttered apartment that Betty shares with Rita, which reflects her feelings of isolation and loneliness.
- Narrative contribution: The physical environment, culture, and society depicted in the screenplay contribute to the narrative in a variety of ways. For example, the dark and winding roads of Mulholland Drive create a sense of mystery and danger that propels the plot forward. The world elements also contribute to the characters' inner lives, which in turn drives the plot. For example, the cramped and cluttered apartment that Betty shares with Rita reflects her feelings of isolation and loneliness, which leads her to make a series of bad decisions.
- Thematic depth contribution: The physical environment, culture, and society depicted in the screenplay contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by exploring the themes of fame, ambition, and the dark side of the entertainment industry. The screenplay also explores the theme of identity, as many of the characters are struggling to find their place in the world. The screenplay also explores the theme of relationships, as many of the characters are struggling to form and maintain meaningful connections with others. The world elements contribute to these themes by providing a setting and a context for the characters' struggles.
central conflict
Betty's search for the truth about Rita's identity and the mystery surrounding the car accident on Mulholland Drive.
primary motivations
- Betty's desire to help Rita regain her memory and discover who she is.
- Rita's desperation to uncover her past and understand the events leading up to the accident.
- The mysterious forces that are pursuing Rita and the secrets they are trying to protect.
catalysts
- The car accident that leaves Rita amnesiac and Betty as her only lifeline.
- The discovery of the blue key and the mysterious cash in Rita's purse.
- The encounters with strange and potentially dangerous individuals, such as the limo drivers and the men in the office building.
barriers
- Rita's amnesia and her reluctance to delve into her past.
- The unknown forces that are pursuing Rita and the threat they pose to Betty's safety.
- The lack of information about the car accident and the difficulty in piecing together Rita's identity.
themes
- The fragility of identity and the search for self.
- The dangers of Hollywood and the dark underbelly that lurks beneath the glamour.
- The power of dreams and the blurring of reality.
stakes
Rita's life, Betty's safety, and the potential exposure of the dark secrets surrounding the world of Hollywood.
uniqueness factor
The film's non-linear narrative, dreamlike imagery, and blend of mystery, psychological thriller, and surrealism.
audience hook
The intriguing mystery of Rita's identity and the tantalizing clues that hint at a larger, more sinister plot.
paradoxical engine or bisociation
The juxtaposition of the glamorous and dreamlike world of Hollywood with the dark and dangerous reality that exists beneath the surface.
paradoxical engine or bisociation 2
The exploration of the duality of identity, as Rita struggles to reconcile her past with the person she has become.
Engine: Gemini
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Executive Summary
Mulholland Drive is a unique and ambitious screenplay with a dreamlike atmosphere and a complex, fragmented narrative. While its strengths lie in its surreal imagery, compelling character arcs, and exploration of Hollywood's dark side, the screenplay could benefit from greater clarity and resolution. The fragmented storytelling and unresolved plot points may alienate some viewers, but the film's overall impact and thought-provoking themes make it a worthwhile consideration for production.
- Dreamlike atmosphere and surreal imagery create a unique and unsettling experience, keeping the audience engaged and guessing. high
- Betty's journey and audition scenes showcase her talent and determination, creating a compelling character arc. high ( Scene 31 Scene 34 )
- The presence of mysterious and powerful figures like the Castigliane brothers and the Cowboy add intrigue and suspense to the narrative. medium ( Scene 10 Scene 21 Scene 25 )
- The gradual unraveling of Rita's identity and the exploration of memory loss create a sense of mystery and keep the audience invested in the story. high ( Scene 7 Scene 20 Scene 38 )
- The exploration of Hollywood's dark side and the contrast between dreams and reality provide a thought-provoking commentary on the entertainment industry. medium
- The fragmented narrative and non-linear storytelling, while effective in creating a dreamlike atmosphere, can also be confusing and alienate some viewers. high
- The subplot involving Joe and the killings feels disconnected from the main narrative and its purpose is unclear. medium ( Scene 8 Scene 13 )
- Some character motivations, particularly those of the secondary characters, are not fully developed or explained. medium
- The pacing of the film can be uneven, with some scenes feeling slow and drawn out, while others feel rushed. medium
- The ending leaves many questions unanswered and can be frustrating for viewers who seek a clear resolution. high
- A clearer connection between the dream sequences and the reality of the characters' lives would help to provide a more satisfying understanding of the story. high
- Further exploration of the themes of identity, memory, and desire would enrich the overall narrative. medium
- Greater integration of the Joe subplot into the main storyline or a clearer explanation of its relevance would improve the narrative flow. medium ( Scene 8 Scene 13 )
- The casting scene with Camilla Rhodes is a pivotal moment that highlights the themes of power, control, and the commodification of beauty in Hollywood. high ( Scene 34 )
- The Cowboy's cryptic message to Adam adds a layer of mystery and foreshadows the dark forces at play in the story. medium ( Scene 25 )
- The discovery of the dead woman in Bungalow #17 is a shocking and disturbing moment that intensifies the sense of danger and mystery. high ( Scene 38 )
- The use of recurring motifs, such as the blue key, the red lampshade, and the Club Silencio, contributes to the film's dreamlike atmosphere and symbolic meaning. medium
Engine: Claude
Consider
Executive Summary
Mulholland Drive is a complex and intriguing screenplay that blends elements of mystery, suspense, and character transformation. While the narrative can feel somewhat disjointed at times, the screenplay showcases strong individual scenes and character moments that suggest significant potential. Key strengths include the effective establishment of narrative hooks and mysteries, the compelling central performances (particularly Betty's audition scene), and the visually striking transformation of Rita. Areas for improvement include enhancing overall narrative cohesion, more clearly defining the central protagonist(s) and their goals, and more consistently exploring the thematic undercurrents. With thoughtful revisions to address these areas, this screenplay could evolve into a compelling and distinctive cinematic experience.
- The opening Denny's scene establishes an effective sense of mystery and unease, building tension through Dan's unsettling dream and the unseen 'man in back' that haunts him. This sets up an intriguing narrative hook. high ( Scene 5 (INT. DENNY'S RESTAURANT , HOLLYWOOD - MORNING) )
- The scene where Betty and Rita discover the money and the blue key in Rita's purse is a gripping moment of mystery and intrigue, effectively raising questions about Rita's past and the nature of the trouble she may be in. high ( Scene 17 (INT. AUNT RUTH'S BEDROOM - DAY) )
- Adam's phone call with Cynthia provides helpful exposition about the Castigliane brothers and the unusual circumstances Adam finds himself in, further advancing the narrative's central mystery. medium ( Scene 24 (INT. ROOM 214 - NIGHT) )
- The Cowboy's cryptic and ominous meeting with Adam is an intriguing plot point, hinting at larger forces at work beyond Adam's control and adding to the screenplay's sense of intrigue and suspense. high ( Scene 25 (EXT. BEACHWOOD CANYON - NIGHT) )
- The audition scene where Betty impresses the casting director and director is a strong showcase of her acting talents, effectively introducing the character and hinting at her potential as a protagonist. medium ( Scene 32 (INT. EXECUTIVE BUILDING - SECOND FLOOR - DAY) )
- The opening sequence, depicting the car accident on Mulholland Drive, feels somewhat disjointed and lacking in clarity. The quick cuts between different locations and perspectives make it difficult to fully follow the chain of events. A more cohesive and streamlined approach to this inciting incident could strengthen the narrative foundation. medium ( Scene 1 (EXT. NIGHT - HOLLYWOOD HILLS, LOS ANGELES) Scene 2 (EXT. HOLLYWOOD HILLS - LATER - NIGHT) Scene 3 (EXT. HOLLYWOOD STREETS - EARLY DAWN) )
- The scenes involving the dark-haired woman, later revealed to be Rita, are somewhat ambiguous and unclear. More exposition or context around her situation and backstory could help the audience better understand her role and connection to the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 6 (INT. APARTMENT - BEDROOM) Scene 7 (INT. APARTMENT BATHROOM) )
- The scenes involving Adam Kesher and the Castigliane brothers feel slightly disconnected from the main narrative focusing on Betty and Rita. While they introduce an intriguing conflict and antagonist, their relevance to the overall story could be better integrated or clarified. medium ( Scene 9 (INT. CONFERENCE ROOM - CENTURY CITY BUILDING - DAY) Scene 10 (EXT. CENTURY CITY - DAY) Scene 11 (INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - LATER DAY) )
- The discovery of the dead body in Bungalow #17 is a shocking and unsettling moment, but its significance and connection to the overall narrative could be better established. More context or exploration of the implications of this discovery would strengthen its impact and relevance. medium ( Scene 36 (EXT. SIERRA BONITA APARTMENT - BACK ALLEY - DAY) Scene 37 (INT. - BUNGALOW #17 - DAY) )
- The transition from the discovery of the body to Rita's emotional reaction and subsequent transformation feels somewhat abrupt. More gradual development of this character arc, or a more seamless integration of these events, could enhance the overall narrative cohesion. medium ( Scene 38 (EXT. SIERRA BONITA APARTMENTS - BUNGALOW #12 - DAY) Scene 39 (INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - BATHROOM - DAY) )
- The screenplay would benefit from a stronger sense of overall narrative cohesion and interconnectedness between the different storylines and characters. While there are many intriguing elements and mysteries introduced, the relationships and thematic connections between them could be more clearly defined and developed. medium ( Scene Overall )
- The screenplay lacks a clear central protagonist or driving narrative force. While Betty and Rita are compelling characters, their respective arcs and motivations are not always clearly delineated or prioritized. Strengthening the protagonist(s) and their central goal(s) could help unify the narrative. high ( Scene Overall )
- The screenplay would benefit from more overt thematic exploration and development. While there are hints of themes related to identity, mystery, and the dark underbelly of Hollywood, these themes are not always clearly or consistently woven throughout the narrative. Greater emphasis on thematic resonance could enhance the screenplay's emotional impact and overall coherence. medium ( Scene Overall )
- The audition scene where Betty impresses the casting director and director is a strong showcase of her acting talents, effectively introducing the character and hinting at her potential as a protagonist. The scene also features a notable chemistry and connection between Betty and the director, Adam Kesher, that could be further explored. medium ( Scene 32 (INT. EXECUTIVE BUILDING - SECOND FLOOR - DAY) )
- The encounter between Betty, Rita, and the musician Cornell Dumont is an intriguing moment that suggests a deeper connection or backstory between Rita and this 'Sol' character. This subtle narrative thread could be expanded upon or more fully integrated into the overall story. medium ( Scene 35 (EXT. COURTYARD - 1612 HAVENHURST DAY) )
- The transformation of Rita into a blonde-haired, fresh-faced woman is a visually striking and emotionally resonant moment, hinting at the character's desire to reinvent herself and start anew. This could be a powerful narrative arc to further explore. high ( Scene 40 (INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - LATER - DAY) )
- The closing scenes where Betty and the 'new' Rita embrace the opportunity to start fresh in Hollywood are emotionally resonant and suggest intriguing narrative possibilities. The sense of hope and possibility, contrasted with the lingering mysteries and potential dangers, creates an intriguing tonal balance. high ( Scene 41 (INT. AUNT RUTH'S APARTMENT - BEDROOM - NIGHT) Scene 42 (EXT. COURTYARD - NIGHT) )