The Umbrella Academy
Executive Summary
Poster
Overview
Genres: Drama, Sci-Fi, Action, Thriller, Mystery, Science Fiction, Fantasy, Family, Comedy, Superhero, Adventure, Crime, Music, Post-Apocalyptic
Setting: 1984 and present day, A Polish village, New York City, Amsterdam, and a mansion known as the Umbrella Academy
Overview: The Umbrella Academy begins with the mysterious births of several extraordinary children around the world, adopted by the enigmatic Sir Reginald Hargreeves. Fast forward to the present, the siblings reunite after their father's death, grappling with their dysfunctional family dynamics and unresolved emotional baggage. As they navigate their complicated relationships, they uncover the mystery surrounding their father's demise, leading to tensions and confrontations among them. The story unfolds through a blend of dark humor, emotional depth, and supernatural elements, culminating in a quest for identity and belonging amidst the chaos of their extraordinary abilities.
Themes: Dysfunctional Family Dynamics, The Search for Identity and Belonging, The Legacy of Trauma and Abuse, The Nature of Family and Love, The Burden of Extraordinary Abilities, Mystery and Intrigue Surrounding the Father's Death
Conflict and Stakes: The siblings grapple with their father's mysterious death, their own fractured relationships, and the looming threat of a post-apocalyptic future.
Overall Mood: Tense and introspective, with moments of dark humor and emotional depth.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: The mood is tense and alarming as Vanya experiences distress, foreshadowing deeper conflicts.
- Scene 2: The emotional tone shifts to one of relief and joy with the birth of a baby amidst a storm.
- Scene 3: The atmosphere is tense and foreboding as villagers confront the mysterious births and Hargreeves' unsettling presence.
- Scene 4: The mood is a mix of haunting beauty and chaotic fame as Vanya's past and present collide.
- Scene 5: The emotional tone is darkly humorous as Klaus interacts with the ashes, reflecting on loss.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The story revolves around a dysfunctional family of superheroes dealing with their father's death and their own powers.
- Major Twist: The revelation of Number Five's time-traveling experiences and the implications of his knowledge about the apocalypse.
- Distinctive Setting: The juxtaposition of a quaint Polish village with the high-tech Umbrella Academy mansion creates a unique backdrop.
- Innovative Ideas: The integration of supernatural abilities with real-world issues like family dynamics and personal struggles.
- Unique Characters: Each sibling has distinct powers and personalities, contributing to the overall narrative complexity.
Comparable Scripts:
- The Umbrella Academy
- The Handmaid's Tale
- The Giver
- Children of Men
- The Secret Garden
- The Babadook
- The Witch
- The Virgin Suicides
- The Others
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a diverse yet cohesive writing style, blending elements of suspense, mystery, dark humor, and emotional depth. It incorporates genre-bending elements, including fantasy, science fiction, and historical settings, often with complex character interactions and morally ambiguous situations. The narrative frequently employs nonlinear storytelling, unexpected twists, and a focus on character development and internal struggles.
Style Similarities:
- Joss Whedon
- Guillermo del Toro
- Neil Gaiman
Pass/Consider/Recommend
Recommend
Explanation: The screenplay for the TV pilot of 'The Umbrella Academy' is a compelling and well-crafted piece that blends elements of superhero, sci-fi, and family drama. The story follows the estranged members of the Umbrella Academy, a group of adopted siblings with extraordinary abilities, as they reunite after the death of their father, Reginald Hargreeves. The pilot introduces the main characters and sets up a compelling mystery surrounding Hargreeves' demise, while also hinting at a looming apocalyptic threat. With its strong character development, engaging plot, and unique stylistic choices, the script showcases the writer's skill and the potential for a captivating TV series.
USP: The unique selling proposition of 'The Umbrella Academy' lies in its unconventional approach to the superhero genre, focusing on the dysfunctional family dynamics of adopted siblings with extraordinary abilities. The blend of dark humor, emotional depth, and a mysterious overarching plot about their father's death and its implications sets it apart from typical superhero narratives, appealing to audiences looking for character-driven stories with a mix of action and drama.
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$30-50 million
Target Audience Demographics: Young adults aged 18-34, fans of superhero and fantasy genres, and viewers interested in complex family dramas.
Marketability: The unique blend of superhero elements with family drama and dark humor appeals to a broad audience, especially fans of the original comic series.
The diverse cast and complex characters provide depth, making it relatable and engaging for viewers.
The themes of loss and identity resonate with audiences, while the supernatural elements add intrigue.
Profit Potential: High, due to the popularity of superhero narratives and potential for franchise expansion through sequels or spin-offs.
Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by a compelling blend of dark humor, intense action, and emotional depth. There's a strong focus on dysfunctional family dynamics, exploring complex relationships marked by both affection and resentment. The narrative frequently juxtaposes moments of high stakes and visceral action with introspective character moments and witty banter, creating a unique tone that is both gripping and emotionally resonant.
Best representation: Scene 17 - Training Day: The Hargreeves Method. Scene 17 best encapsulates the writer's voice because it perfectly balances the key elements of their style. The scene features sharp, revealing dialogue that highlights the complex relationships between the siblings, showcasing both their affection and deep-seated resentments. The underlying tension and suspense, fueled by the mystery surrounding their father's death, is masterfully interwoven with Klaus's darkly humorous interjections, creating a scene that is both emotionally resonant and grippingly suspenseful. It showcases the writer's ability to create a dynamic and engaging scene that explores the central themes of family, loss, and mystery.
Memorable Lines:
- TEDDY BEAR: MY PURPOSE IS LOVE! (Scene 12)
- Luther: There’s no mystery here. There’s nothing to solve, or avenge, or anything else. Dad got old, and he died alone, just like we always knew he would. End of story. (Scene 13)
- Vanya: I just bombed the audition. (Scene 9)
- Diego: He was a monster. He was bad as a person and worse as a father, and the world’s better off without him. (Scene 29)
- Luther: You think one of us did it. (Scene 17)
Characters
Vanya Hargreeves:A talented violinist struggling for acceptance and grappling with her family's legacy.
Number Five:A time-traveling boy who has experienced a post-apocalyptic future and is determined to prevent it.
Luther Hargreeves:The eldest sibling, grappling with his father's expectations and his own identity.
Allison Hargreeves:A former actress with the ability to manipulate reality through her words, dealing with personal loss.
Diego Hargreeves:A rebellious sibling with a strong sense of justice, often at odds with his family.
Klaus Hargreeves:A free-spirited sibling with the ability to communicate with the dead, struggling with addiction.
Reginald Hargreeves:The estranged father of the siblings, whose mysterious past and death drive the plot.
Pogo:The caretaker of the Umbrella Academy, providing wisdom and support to the siblings.
Story Shape
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall Grade | Concept | Plot | Originality Score | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - A Disturbing Transformation | Suspenseful, Mysterious, Dramatic | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - A New Dawn Amidst the Storm | Tense, Emotional, Mysterious | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
3 - The Unsettling Offer | Tense, Mysterious, Cold | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - From Melody to Mayhem | Mysterious, Intriguing, Intense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Night of Terror | Tense, Suspenseful, Dark | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
6 - Rave and Isolation | Mysterious, Intense, Haunting | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Harmony of Chaos | Intense, Dark, Violent | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
8 - Moments of Isolation | Intense, Tense, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
9 - Interrupted Ambition | Intense, Emotional, Nervous | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
10 - A Night of Loss | Tense, Mysterious, Emotional, Shocking | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - Arrival at the Umbrella Academy | Lonely, Austere, Chilly, Small, Alone | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 4 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Fractured Bonds | Tense, Awkward, Disgust, Dismay | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
13 - Confrontation in the Shadows | Tense, Grim, Mysterious, Intense | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - A Bittersweet Discovery | Reflective, Nostalgic, Inquisitive | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Reflections on Loss | Reflective, Melancholic, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
16 - Reflections in the Trophy Room | Wistful, Regretful, Nostalgic, Tense | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Family Secrets Unveiled | Tense, Suspenseful, Serious, Awkward | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Training Day: The Hargreeves Method | Serious, Intense, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - Training in Shadows | Intense, Serious, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
20 - Whispers of Ashes | Reflective, Mysterious, Emotional | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 5 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
21 - A Moment of Reflection | Reflective, Inquisitive, Nostalgic | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Echoes of the Past | Mysterious, Emotional, Tense, Supernatural | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Temporal Turmoil | Tense, Mysterious, Emotional, Humorous | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - A Sandwich and a Time Jump | Confusion, Humor, Mystery | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - Echoes of the Past | Melancholic, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Fractured Bonds | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Fractured Trust | Anger, Sadness, Conflict | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - A Waltz of Absurdity | Humorous, Tense, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Fractured Bonds | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - The Cost of Infiltration | Tense, Mysterious, Deadpan, Somber | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - From Laughter to Chaos | Intense, Suspenseful, Dramatic | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Supernatural Showdown at the Bank | Intense, Suspenseful, Humorous | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - A Moment of Rejection | Somber, Tense, Supernatural, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - The Unexpected Heroes | Tense, Emotional, Supernatural, Humorous, Sombre | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - A Farewell at Dusk | Melancholic, Reflective, Resigned | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
36 - Shadows of Grief | Tense, Humorous, Serious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Night Drive with Hallucinations | Dark, Humorous, Tense | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
38 - Frustration and Freedom | Tense, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Midnight Escape | Tense, Emotional, Intense, Humorous | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
40 - Under the Stars: A Moment of Connection | Reflective, Emotional, Introspective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 4 | 6 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
41 - Reflections and Shadows | Tense, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Diner Showdown | Intense, Suspenseful, Violent | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
43 - Aftermath of Chaos | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
44 - Lost in the Shadows | Tense, Chaotic, Intense, Mysterious | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
45 - The Press Conference: Secrets of the Umbrella Academy | Serious, Mysterious, Intriguing | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
46 - The Eye of Anubis Revelation | Tense, Emotional, Mysterious | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
47 - Awakening the Unknown | Excitement, Mystery, Suspense, Curiosity | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
48 - Vanya's Audition: A Moment of Truth | Intense, Mysterious, Emotional, Tense | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
49 - Letting Go | Conflicted, Tense, Mysterious, Aggressive | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
50 - A Disturbing Revelation | Tense, Mysterious, Intense, Reflective | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
51 - Echoes of Desolation | Hopeless, Haunting, Mysterious, Tense | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 |
Scene 1 - A Disturbing Transformation
A picturesque European village, quaint and charming. We
follow a pretty young TEENAGE GIRL down the street.
FX: RUDKI, POLAND. OCTOBER 1, 1984
Suddenly the girl stops, alarmed, clutching her stomach.
Gritting her teeth, she stumbles on, holding her belly.
And is it our imagination, or is her previously-flat stomach
EXPANDING by the second?
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Scene 2 - A New Dawn Amidst the Storm
Night has fallen. A violent thunderstorm rips through the
heavens. Rain sleeting down. Throughout the village, nervous
TOWNSPEOPLE huddle in groups, whispering, sharing gossip.
INT. POLISH HOME - NIGHT
The Teenage Girl yowls in pain. Her belly is wildly
distended. The doctor emerges from between her legs, holding
a perfectly healthy NEWBORN BABY BOY. The new mother begins
to SOB. In the corner, her parents hold each other.
TITLE CARD: “On the first day of October, 1984, forty-three
women around the world simultaneously gave birth.”
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Scene 3 - The Unsettling Offer
A mob forms. The villagers are scared. Demanding answers.
TITLE CARD: “None of the women showed any prior signs of
pregnancy.”
The mob surrounds the house. Suddenly they are struck by a
BLINDING SPOTLIGHT from above!
A massive STEAM-POWERED DIRIGIBLE hangs in the sky above
them, its rotors churning the air.
The villagers back away in terror as a ROPE LADDER unfurls.
A tall figure descends the ladder. Turns to face the mob.
REGINALD HARGREEVES (40s). World famous explorer,
industrialist and philanthropist. Torchlight reflecting off
his distinctive SILVER MONOCLE.
Hargreeves coldly surveys the gathered crowd. Then wordlessly
enters the home.
TITLE CARD: “Sir Reginald Hargreeves, eccentric billionaire
and playboy adventurer, made it his personal mission to find
and adopt as many of these children as possible.”
INT. POLISH HOME - CONTINUOUS
Hargreeves enters the birthing room. The family stares, too
confused to protest, as he approaches the Teenage Mother.
He examines the newborn in her arms. Pokes it with one
slender finger. Satisfied, he looks to the mother.
HARGREEVES
How much do you want for it?
TITLE CARD: “He got seven of them.”
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Scene 4 - From Melody to Mayhem
New York. A darkened concert hall. A beautiful young woman
takes the stage, violin in hand. She begins to play.
TITLE CARD: 30 YEARS LATER
This is VANYA. Like all our main characters, she is in her
EARLY 30s. Shy. Sweet. Perhaps a bit too fragile for her own
good. Despite this, she plays with an easy confidence.
Her haunting MELODY carries through the rest of the teaser...
EXT. SUNSET BOULEVARD - NIGHT
Paparazzi on motorcycles race after a black Escalade with
tinted windows. Weaving in and out of traffic.
The SUV pulls into the driveway of Los Angeles’s famed
Chateau Marmont. The photographers abandon their bikes, rush
to snap pictures of the woman stepping out of the Escalade.
ALLISON emerges, hidden beneath dark glasses. Perhaps the
most famous woman on the planet. Her BODYGUARDS attempt to
shield her from the flashing cameras--
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Scene 5 - Night of Terror
A quiet suburban neighborhood. We zero in on a specific
house. The back door has been broken. Glass everywhere.
Through the living room window, we see the FAMILY, seated in
the center of the room, bound and gagged.
We rise higher. Through the second story window, we see
MASKED INTRUDERS ransacking the bedroom. A home invasion.
INT. SUBURBAN HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
One of the HOME INVADERS makes his way down the hall, a
shotgun held loosely in his grip. Checking each room in turn.
A FLICKER OF MOTION catches his attention. He spins, gun
raised...but there’s nothing there. Just the darkened window.
Slowly, he lowers the gun. Must have been his imagination.
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Scene 6 - Rave and Isolation
A rave in Amsterdam. Pulsing lights, sweaty bodies. Vanya’s
violin solo BLENDING SEAMLESSLY with the pulsing electronic
music. We DRIFT through the club--
Rising past the spiral staircase--
And finally entering the VIP area, where a pale, emaciated
man LEVITATES in a mid-air lotus pose. Meet KLAUS. Think
David Bowie crossed with Hunter S. Thompson.
EXT. THE MOON - NIGHT
Jagged spires of stone rise from lifeless soil. High overhead
hangs a brilliant blue orb: the EARTH itself.
We’re on THE SURFACE OF THE MOON.
And we’re not alone.
A massive SHAPE sits hunched atop one of the rocky bluffs,
staring out across the desolate wasteland. The details are
hard to make out: he's definitely wearing some sort of
protective suit...but his body proportions are all wrong. The
figure is gigantic, misshapen, grotesquely muscular.
ANGLE on his face. LUTHER. Perhaps the single loneliest man
you’ve ever seen.
The communication device at his side BLINKS to life. Luther
scans the incoming message. His expression shocked.
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Scene 7 - Harmony of Chaos
Now the MONTAGE picks up speed, INTERCUTTING at will--
Vanya launches into a feverish violin solo, the bow moving
almost too fast to see.
INT. SUBURBAN HOUSE - NIGHT
The home invasion is still in progress. One of the robbers
standing over the helpless family.
Behind him, a section of the darkness breaks free, glides
closer. Taking on the proportions of a man, clad in a sleek
COMBAT SUIT, wearing a simple DOMINO MASK. This is DIEGO.
The robber senses something, starts to turn. Too late.
Diego disarms the intruder with brutal efficiency, SHATTERING
the man’s elbow in the process, raining punches into his
kidneys, before finally SLAMMING him face-first through a
glass coffee table. Think Batman, minus the self-control.
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Scene 8 - Moments of Isolation
Allison sits at a table, surrounding by people but somehow
still alone. Everyone else is laughing, drinking, enjoying
being young and famous. Allison just stares straight ahead.
One of her assistants leans in, whispers something in her
ear. Frowning, Allison checks her phone. We PUSH IN--
As her expression changes.
INT. RAVE CLUB - NIGHT
The same thing is happening in Amsterdam. A manager enters
the VIP area and whispers something to Klaus, who is still
levitating in mid-air. He THUMPS back to the ground, stunned.
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Scene 9 - Interrupted Ambition
We return to Vanya, still playing her heart out. As we PAN
AROUND HER, the cell phone in her back pocket suddenly LIGHTS
UP, vibrating.
Her concentration breaks; she plays the wrong note. The solo
comes to a crashing halt.
Vanya stands there, her face burning, knowing she just bombed
the audition. Nevertheless, she manages a polite bow to the
unseen judges watching from the balcony.
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Scene 10 - A Night of Loss
Vanya hurries down the sidewalk, violin case in hand.
Suddenly she stops short, staring at a STOREFRONT TELEVISION.
The screen shows a picture of a DISTINGUISHED OLDER MAN
wearing a gleaming SILVER MONOCLE. The news crawl reads
Eccentric Billionaire and Founder of The Umbrella Academy
Reginald Hargreeves dead at 63.
We PUSH IN on Vanya’s face, as she speaks the only word of
the teaser:
VANYA
Dad.
THE UMBRELLA ACADEMY
ACT ONE
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Scene 11 - Arrival at the Umbrella Academy
A taxi winds its way down a series of twisting gravel roads.
Dense forest on all sides. Vanya sits in the back of the
taxi, gazing out the window. Her mind a million miles away.
EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - GROUNDS - DAY
A sprawling Gothic mansion. Chilly and austere. This is the
fabled UMBRELLA ACADEMY.
The taxi deposits Vanya outside the mansion. She watches as
it pulls away. Feeling very small. Very alone.
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Scene 12 - Fractured Bonds
Once upon a time this was a magical place, a wonderland of
cutting-edge technology and strange archeological artifacts
gathered from around the globe. But Hargreeves spent the last
decade of his life alone, and the once-great manor has fallen
into disrepair.
Nowhere is this more evident than the AUTOMATONS that
Hargreeves created, robotic creations imbued with some small
degree of intelligence. Now these malfunctioning robots
litter the manor, broken and crippled things.
Vanya enters the lobby. A broken AUTOMATON comes limping
toward her, an ancient TEDDY BEAR, its face sloughing off,
arms extended for a hug.
TEDDY BEAR
MY PURPOSE IS LOVE!
Vanya kicks the bear over, steps past. The bear’s legs
continue to scissor mindlessly.
TEDDY BEAR
WHHHHHhhhhyyyyy...
ALLISON
Would ya look at that.
Vanya turns to find Allison standing in the doorway.
ALLISON
Everyone was like taking bets on
whether you’d show.
VANYA
Did you win?
Allison gives a small, rueful shrug. Nope. Then she steps
forward to embrace her sister. It’s an awkward moment.
Neither of them quite ready to make physical contact.
ALLISON
Are we supposed to...how’s this go?
VANYA
I have no idea.
Allison gives Vanya a quick, obligatory hug. Then she
reconsiders, pulls Vanya in closer. Vanya closes her eyes,
rests her chin on Allison’s shoulder. God, she needed this.
ALLISON
I’m glad you’re here.
DIEGO (O.S.)
Least someone is.
They break apart to reveal DIEGO, glaring at Vanya. Unlike
the others, Diego is wearing his usual attire: a Kevlar-
reinforced black bodysuit, complete with domino mask.
ALLISON
Eat shit, Diego.
DIEGO
You’re seriously gonna defend her?
After what she did?
ALLISON
You’re seriously gonna do this
today? At Dad’s funeral?
DIEGO
Dad knew what she was.
He turns away in disgust. Vanya stares after him, dismayed.
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Scene 13 - Confrontation in the Shadows
Hargreeves’ bedroom, chilly and austere. Luther runs his hand
along a FAINT INDENTATION left in the mattress. The spot
where his father slept for the last 30 years.
Luther’s body is hidden beneath a massive OVERCOAT that does
little to disguise his monstrous, unnatural proportions.
(NOTE: In later episodes we will learn that Luther’s head has
been grafted onto the body of a GORILLA. Yes, really.)
Luther moves to the window, examines the locking mechanism.
Behind him, Diego saunters into the room.
DIEGO (O.S.)
If you’re looking for the will,
you’re wasting your time.
Luther glares at his brother. No love lost between these two.
LUTHER
Diego.
DIEGO
But you’re not looking for the
will, are you? Mmm. You’re looking
for something else.
(touches Luther’s
overcoat)
Nice monkey suit, by the way.
Luther irritably slaps his hand away. Diego flops down into
Hargreeves’ favorite armchair, one leg thrown over the side.
LUTHER
What do you want?
DIEGO
To save you some time.
Diego hands Luther a crumpled MEDICAL REPORT.
LUTHER
What is this?
DIEGO
Dad’s autopsy report.
LUTHER
And you have this why?
DIEGO
Because I broke into the county
coroner’s office. The point is, it
was normal, boring old heart
failure.
LUTHER
I know that.
DIEGO
So you’re checking the windows and
doors for...fun?
(Luther ignores him.)
All locked, by the way. No forced
entry, no evidence of a struggle.
LUTHER
Were you the first one on the
scene?
Diego stares at his brother. A flicker of grim amusement.
DIEGO
No. Pogo found him.
LUTHER
What about Dad’s monocle?
DIEGO
What about it?
LUTHER
Do you know where it is?
DIEGO
(ignoring this)
Why are you doing this, Luther?
LUTHER
Asking questions?
DIEGO
Looking for a fight.
(gestures around)
There’s no mystery here. There’s
nothing to solve, or avenge, or
anything else. Dad got old, and he
died alone, just like we always
knew he would. End of story.
(quieter)
I’m trying to help you.
LUTHER
You should leave.
Luther’s voice is gravel, broken glass. The voice of a man
struggling to keep his fury in check. Diego recognizes this.
He tips an imaginary hat, then strolls out of the room.
Luther remains at the window, his massive body silhouetted
against the soft orange light.
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Scene 14 - A Bittersweet Discovery
Vanya enters Hargreeves’ library. She scans the wall-to-
ceiling shelves, searching for a specific title.
To her surprise, she actually finds the book: “Extra
Ordinary: My Life as Number Seven,” by Vanya Hargreeves. The
back cover shows an author photo of Vanya herself.
VANYA
I’ll be damned.
Vanya turns to the inscription page of her book, where she
finds the dedication she wrote to her father:
Dad: I figured...why not? V.
She smiles softly to herself.
POGO (O.S.)
Welcome home, Miss Vanya.
She turns to find an ELDERLY CHIMPANZEE limping into the
room. He’s dressed in a natty tweed jacket. This is POGO.
VANYA
Pogo!
She kneels and embraces Pogo. He returns the embrace warmly.
POGO
It’s so good to see you.
She pulls away, beaming. He notices the book in her hand.
POGO
Ah, yes. Your book.
VANYA
I never knew if he got it. Did
he...did he ever read it?
POGO
Not that I’m aware of. Then again,
your father was a very private man.
Her expression hardens. She returns the book to its shelf.
Hand in hand, they leave the room together.
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Scene 15 - Reflections on Loss
Vanya and Pogo pause before a FRAMED PORTRAIT on the wall. It
shows the young boy we met earlier in the story. The placard
at the bottom of the painting reads NUMBER FIVE.
VANYA
How long has it been?
POGO
Twenty-two years, seven months,
sixteen days.
VANYA
I used to leave the lights on at
night, in case he came back. I
didn’t want him to be scared.
POGO
Your father used to insist he could
feel Number Five’s presence. That
he was still out there, somewhere.
He never gave up hope.
VANYA
And look where it got him.
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Scene 16 - Reflections in the Trophy Room
Meanwhile, Allison enters a cavernous room filled with
UMBRELLA ACADEMY MEMORABILIA. Posters and news clippings of
their exploits. Merchandised toys and costumes.
Allison turns in a slow circle. Her gaze falls on--
A LIFE-SIZED MURAL, painted across the far wall. It shows
Allison and her siblings as CHILDREN. They’re wearing
matching costumes and domino masks, each one striking a
different heroic pose. Only Vanya is missing from the mural.
Allison browses the memorabilia room, her expression wistful,
perhaps just the tiniest bit embarrassed. She picks up a
stack of old TEEN MAGAZINES. (Think: Tiger Beat.)
YOUNG ALLISON graces every cover, glamorous, already a star
in the making. “Have You Heard The Rumor?” “Rumor Has It!”
ALLISON
Jesus.
LUTHER (O.S.)
Allison.
She turns to find LUTHER standing in the doorway.
LUTHER
I...wasn’t sure you’d come. Where’s
Patrick?
ALLISON
Filed for divorce eight months ago.
LUTHER
What about Claire?
ALLISON
(avoiding eye contact)
He got sole custody.
LUTHER
I’m sorry.
Allison picks up another magazine. Hargreeves on the cover.
ALLISON
He’s really gone, huh?
LUTHER
When’s the last time you talked to
him?
ALLISON
God, who knows. Before Claire was
born, so, what, maybe seven years
ago? Eight? What about you?
LUTHER
He called me every day. Every
single day.
KLAUS (O.S.)
You know what I love about
funerals?
Klaus FLOATS into the room, doing a lazy mid-air backstroke.
KLAUS
Everything I own is black.
(noticing Allison)
If it isn’t my baby sister. Ooh,
and the mighty Spaceboy.
LUTHER
The name’s Luther.
KLAUS
The old man kicks it and the code
names are the first to go. Shame.
He drifts backwards out of the room, humming merrily.
LUTHER
So he’s still insane.
She grins back at him.
ALLISON
Is it weird that I find that
strangely comforting?
LUTHER
Did you see Diego?
ALLISON
With his stupid little mask? God.
LUTHER
You think he wears it in the
bathroom? Like in the shower?
ALLISON
Oh, one hundred percent.
Their smiles gradually fade. Both of them remembering the
task still at hand. Luther sighs heavily.
LUTHER
Okay. Wanna get this over with?
She nods. Luther starts toward the door. Allison hesitates.
ALLISON
Hey, Luther...? It’s...it’s really
good to see you again.
LUTHER
Yeah. You, too.
He holds her gaze, longing and regret in equal measure.
Allison senses the pull just as strongly. Then Luther
remembers what he has become. Breaks the connection.
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Scene 17 - Family Secrets Unveiled
Diego, Vanya, Klaus, and Allison are seated at the long
dining table. Luther enters, moves to the head of the table.
DIEGO
Can we hurry this along?
LUTHER
I thought we could have the
memorial service at sundown. Out by
Dad’s favorite tree.
ALLISON
Dad had a favorite tree?
LUTHER
The big elm? He, um...he used to
take me out there and we’d sit
and...and talk about...
Luther trails off, awkward, as he realizes none of the others
were ever privy to this particular side of Hargreeves.
LUTHER
It doesn’t matter. What’s important
is: there are things we still need
to discuss.
KLAUS
Question. Will there be food?
ALLISON
(ignoring Klaus)
Like what?
LUTHER
Like Dad. The way he died.
DIEGO
Aaaand here we go.
VANYA
I thought it was a heart attack?
LUTHER
According to the coroner.
ALLISON
Yeah, well, I think he’d know.
LUTHER
His heart stopped at 4:32 in the
morning. We know the exact moment,
because of his pacemaker.
VANYA
Why does that matter?
LUTHER
There are over 250 cameras on the
property. You know how Dad was.
ALLISON
Paranoid?
DIEGO
Insane?
KLAUS
Tall.
LUTHER
He died at 4:32. Three minutes
before that, the cameras stopped
recording. All of them. There’s a
ten minute gap before they come
back online.
A moment while this sinks in.
KLAUS
Wait, sorry, I wasn’t listening.
What?
They ignore him. Allison mulls this over.
ALLISON
You’re saying someone killed him.
Made it look like natural causes.
LUTHER
And then erased the footage.
VANYA
Okay, hold up, confused. Who had
that kind of access?
LUTHER
It’s the same system from when we
were kids. Retinal scan grants full
access. I tested it to make sure.
A beat to process that.
VANYA
What...what does that mean?
DIEGO
Please. Like it’s not obvious.
(looks to Luther)
You’re not telling us this because
you want our help. Are you?
DIEGO (CONT'D)
(Luther is silent.)
You think one of us did it.
The news sinks in around the table. Vanya looks to Diego,
Allison to Luther. Luther stares back, impassive.
KLAUS
But there’s definitely no food?
END OF ACT ONE
ACT TWO
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Scene 18 - Training Day: The Hargreeves Method
We follow Hargreeves as he prowls the Academy TRAINING ROOM.
A futuristic cross between NASA’s Jet Propulsion Laboratory
and the X-Men’s Danger Room.
We pass an exercise area, where YOUNG LUTHER is effortlessly
bench-pressing more than 500 pounds--
HARGREEVES
Mind your form, Number One.
YOUNG LUTHER
Yes, sir.
He passes a WATER TANK where YOUNG DIEGO floats, submerged,
arms crossed, looking bored. A TECHNICIAN monitors the boy.
HARGREEVES
How long’s he been in there?
TECHNICIAN #1
Going on six hours.
HARGREEVES
Tell him he can come out at ten.
Inside the tank, Young Diego gives Hargreeves the finger.
Hargreeves continues on, passing YOUNG KLAUS, who stands
motionless, trembling, eyes shut tightly in concentration.
Hargreeves sees the boy is struggling, leans down.
HARGREEVES
(quietly)
Clear your mind.
YOUNG KLAUS
But...the voices...
HARGREEVES
The voices are there to serve you.
Not the other way around. Your fear
is a weapon, and I want you to use
it. Now. Clear your mind.
Young Klaus takes a deep breath, his face going slack--
Behind them, every object in sight slowly LEVITATES off the
ground. Bobbing and hovering in mid-air. Hargreeves nods
curtly, claps Klaus on the shoulder, continues on.
Hargreeves passes YOUNG ALLISON, curled up on a bench reading
a paperback novel.
HARGREEVES
You’re supposed to be training,
Number Three.
YOUNG ALLISON
I heard a rumor I didn’t have to.
HARGREEVES
(agreeing instantly)
Quite right.
Hargreeves keeps walking, pushes through a pair of doors--
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Scene 19 - Training in Shadows
We follow Hargreeves down a narrow corridor, past a series of
individual training rooms. (Think racquetball courts,
modified with floor-to-ceiling bulletproof shielding.)
Inside the first court, a group of frightened-looking ARMED
SOLDIERS react with terror to something headed their way.
They open fire with BEANBAG SHOTGUNS and STUN RIFLES--
A MONSTROUS, LOVECRAFTIAN HORROR rampages into view,
tentacles flailing. We realize the hapless soldiers are
actually sparring partners for this thing.
Without breaking stride, Hargreeves nods his approval as the
monster flattens the guards.
HARGREEVES
Excellent work, Number Six.
YOUNG VANYA (O.S.)
Ben.
Hargreeves turns. YOUNG VANYA stands behind him, defiant.
YOUNG VANYA
His name’s Ben.
Hargreeves makes a sour face. In the b.g., one of the guards
gets SLAMMED face-first into the observation window.
HARGREEVES
You’re not supposed to be down
here.
He turns, keeps walking. The little girl calls after him.
YOUNG VANYA
We have names!
Hargreeves arrives at another testing room. Another UMBRELLA
TECHNICIAN stands before an observation window.
HARGREEVES
How’s he doing?
TECHNICIAN #2
See for yourself. Should be
arriving in 4...3...2...
Through the window, we see an empty training room, filled
with PLASTIC DUMMIES dressed like armed terrorists.
For a moment, nothing happens.
Then the room explodes into CHAOS. Every dummy violently
WHIPS BACK AND FORTH. Heads vanish, limbs snap. KNIVES
appear, buried to the hilt in the plastic bodies.
At the same time, a small, serious boy BLINKS into existence,
standing in the center of the room, quite bored. This is
NUMBER FIVE. A ruthless little war machine.
HARGREEVES
Slow it down.
The Tech replays the footage in SUPER-SLOW MOTION. We see
that Number Five is actually TELEPORTING around the room,
moving almost too fast to follow. Stabbing dummies, brutally
snapping their necks. Hargreeves smiles, impressed.
HARGREEVES
He’s perfect.
TECHNICIAN #2
He’s reckless. One miscalculation
and he could get lost in time.
HARGREEVES
That won’t happen. Will it, Number
Five?
Number Five fixes his father with a cool stare.
NUMBER FIVE
No, Father.
We DISSOLVE back to THE PRESENT...
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Scene 20 - Whispers of Ashes
A CERAMIC URN is opened. It’s filled with CREMATED ASHES.
Klaus dips his hand into the urn, lets the ashes spill
through his fingertips. Glances around the room.
KLAUS
Come out, come out, wherever you
are.
(leans in closer:)
Luther says you were killed. I
don’t know about that, but...if you
were...and you wanted to, I don’t
know, give me some kind of sign...
He waits a moment. Then sighs, disappointed.
KLAUS
You always were a stubborn bastard.
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Scene 21 - A Moment of Reflection
The walls of Hargreeves’ office are covered with hunting
trophies. Some we recognize--elephant, bear, rhino--and some
we do not. Some don’t look like they came from this planet.
Luther sits behind a massive mahogany desk, ransacking the
drawers. He’s searching for something...but what?
POGO (O.S.)
Master Luther.
Pogo limps into the room. Cradling something in his paws.
LUTHER
I’m looking for Dad’s monocle. Have
you seen it?
POGO
No. I would assume it’s with the
rest of his personal effects.
LUTHER
(distracted)
It’s not. Already checked...
Pogo clears his throat. Tries again.
POGO
Your father left me with a specific
set of instructions. In the
unlikely event of his passing, he
wanted you to have this.
Pogo gives Luther a small RUBY GEM, intricately cut. Luther
takes the gem, smiling softly to himself.
LUTHER
The Eye of Anubis. We took it from
Boss Tutankhamun. First mission I
ever led.
(quieter)
It was the best day of my life.
POGO
Perhaps that’s why he wanted you to
have it, Master Luther.
Luther is silent for a beat, turning the gem in his hand.
LUTHER
The others think I’m crazy.
POGO
In their defense, you did accuse
one of them of patricide.
LUTHER
So you don’t believe me either?
POGO
In my short time on this earth,
I’ve seen incredible things from
the children of the Umbrella
Academy. I’ve seen courage and
imagination beyond all reckoning.
Moments of weakness, yes, of
course. But what I have not seen is
cowardice, or treachery. And to
kill a man in his sleep is the
ultimate act of cowardice.
Pogo limps away. Hesitates a moment in the doorway.
POGO
You should have faith in your
family, Master Luther. They still
have faith in you.
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Scene 22 - Echoes of the Past
Vanya sits on her childhood bed, surrounded by dolls and
stuffed animals. The room hasn’t changed in twenty years.
The overhead lights begin to FLICKER. We hear a RATTLE--
An old SILVER LOCKET on the table has begun to VIBRATE. As
Vanya stares, the locket is suddenly flung across the room
and PINNED IN PLACE against the far wall!
INT. MANSION - MASTER BATHROOM - SAME TIME
Allison has changed into her funeral attire: black dress,
mourning veil. As she studies herself in the mirror, the
reflection VIBRATES. We hear a RUMBLE--
INT. MANSION - KITCHEN - SAME TIME
Klaus, watching in confusion as various metal objects are
magnetically hurled across the room. Dozens of pieces of
SILVERWARE are already pinned against the nearest wall.
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Scene 23 - Temporal Turmoil
Diego bursts out of the mansion. Pogo follows close behind.
A BLAZING ELECTROMAGNETIC DISTURBANCE hovers just above the
driveway, hissing and crackling like a fireball. The air
around them is alive, ripped by gale force WINDS.
The others emerge, one by one. Vanya. Klaus. Allison. And
finally Luther.
Klaus takes one look at the fireball, then ducks back inside.
VANYA
(shouting to be heard)
What is it?
LUTHER
Get back. Don’t touch it!
DIEGO
Yeah, no shit.
POGO
It appears to be some sort of
temporal anomaly. Or possibly a
black hole.
DIEGO
Pretty big difference there, Pogo!
Klaus returns, holding a tiny FIRE EXTINGUISHER.
ALLISON
What the hell are you going to do
with that?
KLAUS
(freaking the fuck out)
I don’t know! Do you have a better
idea?!?
The disturbance is getting brighter, more powerful. The
observers are forced to shield their eyes.
VANYA
Umm...running? I vote for running?
LUTHER
Everyone get behind me.
Instinctively, Allison reaches out, takes Luther’s hand. He
glances down, surprised despite himself.
WHOOOOOOM! Without warning, the disturbance seems to IMPLODE,
folding in upon itself. The winds abruptly subside.
The disturbance is gone. In its place is a TINY FORM, smoke
rising from his body. The figure straightens up.
It’s NUMBER FIVE. Still ten years old. Although we haven’t
seen him in twenty-two years, he hasn’t aged a day.
ALLISON
Holy shit.
KLAUS
Dooooooes anyone else see the
little Number Five? Just me?
Number Five calmly scans his surroundings.
NUMBER FIVE
Anyone care to tell me what year
this is?
END OF ACT TWO
ACT THREE
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Scene 24 - A Sandwich and a Time Jump
Number Five enters the kitchen, heads straight for the
fridge. The others follow him, still hopelessly confused.
LUTHER
What are you doing?
NUMBER FIVE
Making a sandwich. Do you know how
long it’s been since I’ve eaten
solid food?
Number Five opens the fridge door. Luther slams it shut
again. Number Five glances up, annoyed.
NUMBER FIVE
You look ridiculous, by the way.
LUTHER
It’s been 22 years, Number Five.
Where have you been?
NUMBER FIVE
It’s been a lot longer than that.
He opens the fridge again, digs out some ingredients.
VANYA
What happened to you?
Number Five stands on a chair so he can reach the counter. He
begins slathering mayonnaise on bread.
NUMBER FIVE
What do you think happened? I
decided to test the limits of my
time jumping, see how far I could
go. Turns out, pretty far.
Klaus elbows Diego. Diego grudgingly passes him FIVE BUCKS.
NUMBER FIVE
Dad always warned me not to go too
far into the future. On account of
my jumps only working in one
direction. This time, he was right.
(takes a bite)
Christ, I needed that.
Allison sits down across from the boy, studying him.
ALLISON
Then how did you get back?
Number Five answers through a mouthful of sandwich:
NUMBER FIVE
By projecting my consciousness
backwards into a suspended quantum
state version of myself that exists
in every possible instance of time.
DIEGO
That makes no sense.
NUMBER FIVE
It would if you were smarter.
(another bite)
Granted, it did take me a little
time to work out all the nuts and
bolts of it...
ALLISON
How much time?
NUMBER FIVE
Ahh...52 years. Give or take.
DIEGO
You’re sixty-two?
NUMBER FIVE
No, my consciousness is 62. My
body’s still ten. But, the point
is, Dad said it couldn’t be done
and I did it. So.
(looks around)
Where is the old bastard, anyway? I
want to rub it in his face.
LUTHER
He died three days ago.
The boy stares at him, chewing, his face impassive.
NUMBER FIVE
Natural causes?
DIEGO LUTHER
Yes. We don’t know.
NUMBER FIVE
Well. That complicates things.
LUTHER
What kind of things?
NUMBER FIVE
All kinds of things. What’s today’s
date? The exact date?
ALLISON
The, uh, 14th. I think.
NUMBER FIVE
Of what?
ALLISON
July.
The boy frowns, dismayed. Slides off his stool.
NUMBER FIVE
Hmm. Doesn’t leave us much time.
Gnawing on his sandwich, the boy strolls out of the room.
LUTHER
Time for what? We’re not done here!
(no answer)
Number Five!
Number Five climbs the stairs, disappears. Luther glances
around the room helplessly. The others look just as confused.
Except for Klaus. He points to the sandwich ingredients.
KLAUS
Is there more pastrami?
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Scene 25 - Echoes of the Past
Vanya goes looking for Number Five, finds him standing in his
old bedroom, staring at his old toys and books, forlorn.
NUMBER FIVE
He kept all my things.
Vanya kneels behind him, wraps her arms around him. The boy
pulls away at once, flinching angrily.
NUMBER FIVE
What are you doing?
VANYA
It’s called a hug.
NUMBER FIVE
Hug. Right.
(considers this)
I may have reacted...poorly
downstairs. Side effect of 52 years
without any physical contact.
VANYA
What do you mean?
He gazes at her for a long beat. Struggling with some
internal decision. But instead of answering, he turns away.
NUMBER FIVE
I read your book, you know. Found
it in a public library. That’s how
I knew how bad things had gotten.
How Number Six died.
VANYA
(gently correcting)
Ben.
NUMBER FIVE
How we failed.
(angrily)
This is the wrong time. I came too
late. Delores always said my
equation was off. Must have forgot
to carry the second two...
VANYA
Who’s Delores?
NUMBER FIVE
(ignoring the question)
There’s another option. Someone, or
something, pulled me out of the
timestream early. Brought me here
to this exact moment.
VANYA
But why?
The boy doesn’t answer. He stares out the window, haunted.
NUMBER FIVE
They know I’m here.
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Scene 26 - Fractured Bonds
Allison enters her father’s old office. Luther is studying
the AUTOPSY REPORT that Diego stole from the coroner.
We glimpse EVIDENCE PHOTOS of Reginald Hargreeves lying dead
in his bed, hands clasped peacefully across his chest. It’s
the first time we’ve seen Hargreeves without his trademark
silver monocle.
ALLISON
It’s time. If you wanted to, you
know. Get changed.
LUTHER
You do realize I can’t just buy
suits off the rack, right?
(noticing)
Are you mad at me?
ALLISON
Am I mad? Do you even know how
messed up that was back there? You
can’t just drop a bomb like, hey, I
think one of you might have killed
Dad, and just leave it like that.
LUTHER
I didn’t--
ALLISON
That’s exactly what you did.
LUTHER
(ticking on his fingers)
I’m just saying, look how we turned
out. Vanya, insecure wreck. Diego,
‘roid rage poster boy. Klaus,
barely keeping it together--
ALLISON
What about Allison? “Tabloid
disaster?” “World’s worst mom?”
LUTHER
I didn’t say that--
ALLISON
You gonna blame Dad for the way I
turned out? Or what about Number
Five? He just showed up, maybe you
wanna go accuse him of murder!
LUTHER
Yeah, and he just happens to show
up today? That doesn’t seem like a
hell of a coincidence to you?
She shakes her head, disgusted.
ALLISON
Dad’s not the victim here, Luther.
We were. We all got screwed over.
That doesn’t mean we have a motive.
(leans in closer)
Why are you doing this? What, like
all of the sudden we’re going to
break out the spandex again? Maybe
go beat the shit out of Dr.
Terminal?
LUTHER
You think that’s what this is
about? The Academy?
Luther angrily brushes past her.
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Scene 27 - Fractured Trust
Allison follows Luther out of the office.
ALLISON
Then what? Why do you even care?
Luther spins around. CRUNCH. Puts his fist through the
nearest wall, hard enough to leave a basketball-sized hole.
LUTHER
(in a rage)
Because he sent me up there! He
said, Watch for threats, Number
One. He said, No one else can do
this but you. And I trusted him!
Four years, by myself, staring at a
bunch of goddamn rocks. And every
single morning I had to tell
myself, ‘Don’t worry, Dad must have
had his reasons. One day this will
all make sense.’ And it was for
nothing.
Allison gazes up at him sadly. Reaches out to touch his arm.
Luther irritably slaps her hand away.
LUTHER
You wanna talk motive, how’s that
for getting “screwed over”?
He turns and storm away. Allison stares after him, unhappy.
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Scene 28 - A Waltz of Absurdity
Meanwhile, Diego saunters down a different corridor. He
pauses outside the grand ballroom. His jaw drops.
The ballroom is filled with FLOATING CLOTHES. Men’s suits and
women’s dresses, all performing a slow, elaborate BALLROOM
WALTZ. Klaus stands in the center, spinning and pirouetting,
conducting this madness.
DIEGO
Klaus.
Klaus whips around, startled. All the clothes COLLAPSE to the
floor at once.
KLAUS
Certainly not dancing with Mother’s
old clothes!
(uncertain beat)
You did ask what I’m doing...?
DIEGO
No.
KLAUS
Well, then. I wasn’t doing
anything. At all.
(awkwardly)
And you, what about you, brother,
what’s been keeping you busy these
days? Fun in the sun? Maybe some
light beach volleyball?
DIEGO
My job.
KLAUS
Ah, yes. Beating criminals
senseless. Breaking bones and
cracking skulls.
DIEGO
Saving lives. What have you been
doing?
Klaus just grins. Behind him, the clothes LEVITATE back into
the air, forming the word DRUGS in giant letters.
Diego shakes his head, keeps walking.
DIEGO
Idiot.
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Scene 29 - Fractured Bonds
One by one, the siblings emerge from the mansion. Single-
file, they start across the field.
EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - GROUNDS - MOMENTS LATER
The funeral takes place beneath a towering elm tree. All six
surviving Umbrella siblings are in attendance.
Luther is carrying the URN containing Hargreeves’ ashes. The
others form a loose semi-circle around him.
Nearby, a trio of ANCIENT AUTOMATONS play an especially
shitty rendition of Amazing Grace on their trumpets.
Pogo is the last to arrive, supporting himself on his cane.
POGO
Whenever you’re ready, dear boy.
Luther inverts the urn. The ashes slide out in a clump,
landing in a pile at his feet. It’s kind of pathetic.
KLAUS
Probably would have been better
with some wind.
Pogo glares at Klaus. Then clears his throat.
POGO
Does anyone wish to speak?
We pan around the circle. Luther. Diego. Allison. Number
Five. Klaus. Vanya. No one speaks.
POGO
Very well. In all regards, Reginald
Hargreeves made me the creature I
am today. For that alone, I shall
forever be in his debt. He was my
friend, and my master, and I shall
miss him very much. He was a...a
complicated man--
DIEGO
(quietly)
He was a monster. He was bad as a
person and worse as a father, and
the world’s better off without him.
ALLISON
Kraken, you ass.
DIEGO
My name is not Kraken! Don’t you
get that? We’re more than the names
he gave us!
(points to the mansion)
This entire place is a lie. That’s
his legacy.
LUTHER
We’re his legacy.
DIEGO
Well, I hope he’s proud.
(pointing to Klaus,
Allison, Vanya)
Drug addict. Fame whore. Traitor.
(re: Number Five)
Whatever the hell you are.
(and finally Luther)
And the mighty Spaceboy.
LUTHER
At least I didn’t turn tail and
run.
DIEGO
No, you sat on the moon like a good
little doggie. He had to send you
240,000 miles away. That’s how much
he couldn’t stand the sight of you.
Luther loses his temper, lunges for Diego--
But Diego is faster. Ducking Luther’s giant fists. One lucky
shot and Luther will take his head clean off.
VANYA
STOP IT!
KLAUS
(halfhearted, kind of
enjoying this)
Yeah, no, stop it...
Now Diego turns the tables on Luther. Luther may have the
size, but Diego certainly has the speed. He strikes Luther
several times in quick succession--
Luther grabs Diego’s jacket, HURLS him through the air--
Diego flips around in mid-air, springs off the wall--
KICKING Luther in the face--
POGO
Boys! Stop this at once!
Luther BULL-RUSHES Diego, slamming him into the elm tree--
Number Five rolls his eyes, starts walking back toward the
mansion. Klaus lights a joint and settles in to watch.
Meanwhile, Luther hauls back, delivers a haymaker--
Diego ducks away. The punch cleaves the tree in half--
ALLISON
Aaaaand there goes Dad’s favorite
tree.
KLAUS
(exhaling smoke)
Best funeral ever.
As the tree crashes down, Diego and Luther continue to fight.
But it’s becoming apparent they’re too evenly matched;
neither brother can gain the upper hand.
Diego pulls something from his belt: a CURVED FIGHTING KNIFE.
As Luther swings again, he whips the knife through the air--
The blade tears open the sleeve of Luther’s overcoat. But we
don’t see bare skin underneath. We see COARSE ANIMAL FUR.
The fight goes out of Luther at once. He stumbles backwards,
clapping a hand over the fur, hiding it from sight.
DIEGO
There’s your legacy right there.
Thanks, Dad.
Luther looks around wildly. Meets Allison’s gaze for a
heartbeat. Then turns and lumbers back toward the mansion.
Vanya gets in Diego’s face, shoves his chest.
VANYA
You’re an asshole.
DIEGO
And you’re trespassing. Why did you
even come back, Vanya?
ALLISON
Diego, shut up.
DIEGO
No, no, let me guess: writing a
sequel! I hope you got enough
material.
Vanya’s eyes fill with tears. She storms away, heading not
for the mansion, but for the gate at the bottom of the hill.
POGO
Oh, dear.
Allison heads after Luther. After a moment, Diego wanders
away, leaving Klaus alone. Klaus kneels, pokes a finger into
the pile of HARGREEVES’ ASHES on the ground.
KLAUS
Bet you’re just loving this.
Birds cry overhead. There is no other answer.
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Scene 30 - The Cost of Infiltration
Deep in the forest, figures are moving. We catch flashes of
ORANGE-AND-BLACK BODY ARMOR. Leather boots tromping through
mud. Sunlight glinting off FUTURISTIC WEAPONRY.
Slowly, the figures emerge from the underbrush. Each is
wearing a GAS MASK HELMET with reflective ORANGE GOGGLES.
These are the TEMPS AETERNALIS.
The LEAD TEMP surveys the Academy grounds. His flunkies
consult their high-tech scanning equipment.
TEMP #1
Target’s definitely inside.
TEMP #2
No sign of defensive measures.
The Lead Temp motions to an agent we’ll call DEAD MEAT TEMP.
Dead Meat starts forward, moving cautiously. He climbs
through a gap in the crumbling stone wall--
The second he steps foot onto Umbrella property, a MASSIVE
BOOBY-TRAP explodes from the soil! It looks like a LASER-GRID
FLYSWATTER. The Flyswatter SLAMS down on the luckless Temp,
bisecting him into hundreds of tiny cubes.
The other Temps stare. No one seems particularly heartbroken.
LEAD TEMP
(deadpan)
All right, well. Let’s not do that
again. All units, fall back.
TEMP #2
What about the target?
LEAD TEMP
We can wait. We’ve got all the time
in the world.
One by one, they melt backwards into the forest.
END OF ACT THREE
ACT FOUR
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Scene 31 - From Laughter to Chaos
Another FLASHBACK. A quartet of NINETIES YUPPIES--two guys,
two girls--clown their way down the sidewalk. This looks like
the intro to your typical 90’s sitcom.
They reach a BANK. One of the guys holds the door open for
his friends as they all enter--
INT. BANK - CONTINUOUS - FLASHBACK
--And the lead Guy promptly GETS HIS NOSE BASHED IN by the
butt of a combat shotgun! The Yuppie Girls SCREAM as several
ARMED BANK ROBBERS grab them and haul them inside.
ROBBER #2
GET DOWN! ON THE GODDAMN GROUND!
HARD CUT TO:
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Scene 32 - Supernatural Showdown at the Bank
Hours later. The bank is under siege. We follow a ROBBER #4
as he patrols the floor, AK-47 in hand. Various CUSTOMERS and
BANK EMPLOYEES huddle on the floor, sobbing, terrified.
We approach ROBBER #1, currently in the process of losing his
shit as he talks to a hostage negotiator over the phone.
ROBBER #1
I don’t give a shit! You are out of
time! I told you what would happen,
didn’t I? Didn’t I tell you?
He gestures angrily. Robber #2 yanks a frightened BANK TELLER
to his feet, drags the man over.
ROBBER #1
Get him over here. C’mere.
(back to the phone:)
I want you to listen real careful.
He holds out the phone to the Bank Teller.
ROBBER #1
Yo. Tell him your name.
BANK TELLER
Craig. Craig Davis.
ROBBER #1
(into phone)
You go home tonight, your wife
asks, “how was work,” you tell her,
oh, not bad, got a guy named Craig
Davis killed.
(the negotiator protests)
No. We’re done talking. Now you’re
gonna listen.
The Bank Teller MOANS, closes his eyes. Robber #1 drops the
phone, steps forward, raising his pistol--
YOUNG ALLISON (O.S.)
Excuse me, sir?
They turn to find 10-YEAR-OLD ALLISON standing before them.
She’s wearing a protective bodysuit and a black domino mask.
ROBBER #1
The hell--?
YOUNG ALLISON
I heard a rumor you can’t stop
sneezing.
Robber #1 looks confused for a moment. Then he SNEEZES,
violently. Again and again. The other robbers look confused.
Robber #1 steadies himself against a desk, eyes watering,
gasping for breath. Still sneezing, he gestures to his men:
get her! The other robbers start forward.
That’s when all hell breaks loose.
Robber #5 is JERKED OFF HIS FEET by an invisible force. His
body rockets straight up, ricocheting off the ceiling--
A HORRIBLE SCREAM rings out! We WHIP AROUND to see Robber #4
being dragged headfirst into an airduct by a pair of
MONSTROUS GREEN TENTACLES--
Robber #2 whirls, sees NUMBER FIVE standing on the counter.
He raises his gun, just as Number Five BLINKS out of sight--
Robber #2 glances down. Sees that, somehow, in the blink of
an eye, his gun has been replaced by a JANITOR’S SQUEEGEE. A
split-second later, he is SLAMMED SIDEWAYS out of frame by a
SMALL, DARK BLUR--
The room has erupted into chaos. We follow one of the YUPPIE
HOSTAGES as she crawls frantically across the floor--
Ahead of her, a table EXPLODES into splinters as a Robber #4
is dropped from the sky. The hostage SCREAMS as something
goes STREAKING through the air just above her.
The action is overwhelming, a little frightening. This is
what it’s like to be in the presence of gods.
Robber #1 is the last gunman left standing. He SNEEZES again,
then turns on Allison. She smiles sweetly.
YOUNG ALLISON
I heard a rumor your gun doesn’t
work.
Snarling, he aims at her, pulls the trigger--
CLICK. The gun misfires. Allison shrugs slightly.
YOUNG ALLISON
Told you.
A split-second later, YOUNG LUTHER drops from the sky,
CRUSHING the gunman downward out of frame--
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Scene 33 - A Moment of Rejection
Hostages flee the bank. They are met in the street by the
POLICE PRESENCE surrounding the building.
From inside the bank, we hear a DULL IMPACT. Several windows
explode, showering the street with glass.
A SHADOW falls across one of the cops. He looks skyward--
Hargreeves’ STEAM-POWERED DIRIGIBLE hangs over the city.
INT. DIRIGIBLE OBSERVATION DECK - CONTINUOUS - FLASHBACK
Hargreeves watches from the observation deck. YOUNG VANYA is
at his side, her face pressed up against the glass.
YOUNG VANYA
Dad? I mean, Mr. Monocle, sir? Why
can’t I go play with the others?
HARGREEVES
Well, Number Seven...there’s just
nothing special about you.
She hangs her head. In a quiet voice:
YOUNG VANYA
Oh.
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Scene 34 - The Unexpected Heroes
Police, hostages, and TV camera crews all watch, astounded,
as the bank doors open and the rescuers emerge...
They’re children. Little kids wearing domino masks.
Young Luther surveys the scene, beaming with pride.
This is what a superhero looks like. And the world will never
be the same.
We DISSOLVE back to the present...
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Scene 35 - A Farewell at Dusk
Dusk. The sky bathed in hues of purple and blue. Vanya stands
by the road, checking her phone. Behind her, the security
gate creaks open and Pogo emerges.
VANYA
If you’re gonna convince me to
stay, you’re wasting your time.
POGO
I was going to offer you a ride.
VANYA
The car’s almost here. But thanks.
(stares into the distance)
He’s not wrong, you know. Diego.
She looks at Pogo solemnly.
VANYA
I don’t belong here.
POGO
I hope you know...your father loved
you all very much. In his own way.
VANYA
Yeah, well. That’s kind of the
problem, isn’t it?
She kneels, hugs him fiercely.
VANYA
Goodbye, Pogo.
POGO
Miss Vanya.
The taxi arrives. Vanya climbs in the back. Pogo watches
sadly as the car pulls away. Vanishing into the night.
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Scene 36 - Shadows of Grief
The siblings have retreated to adjacent rooms. Luther is
slumped in the darkened sitting room. Number Five is scouring
the kitchen for some instant coffee. Klaus floats above him,
staring raptly at his fingers, stoned out of his gourd.
NUMBER FIVE
Has to be here somewhere. What kind
of adult doesn’t drink coffee?
Allison meets Pogo in the foyer.
ALLISON
Where’s Vanya?
POGO
She left.
NUMBER FIVE
Pity. She’s the only one of you I
actually trust.
(glancing up)
Her and the floating idiot.
KLAUS
(slurred)
That’s Miiiiiister Floating Idiot.
Allison glances at Luther, sitting alone in the darkness.
ALLISON
Luther? You okay?
He doesn’t answer. Diego enters, carrying his duffel bag.
DIEGO
Give him a banana, he’ll perk right
up.
ALLISON
Oh good, Diego’s still here. Said
no one. Ever.
Diego pauses, glances around at his siblings.
DIEGO
So. Lots of fun, guys. Let’s totes
do it again.
KLAUS
Yes, let’s!
As he turns to leave, Luther finally speaks up:
LUTHER
No one else is leaving.
DIEGO
Hey, look at that, right on time.
ALLISON
Luther--
LUTHER
We have to figure this out--
DIEGO
There is nothing to figure out! Dad
died, the world spins on, the end.
LUTHER
You read the autopsy report.
DIEGO
And...?
LUTHER
When they found the body, his
monocle was missing.
DIEGO
And?
LUTHER
And think about it. Have any of
you, ever, seen Dad without that
monocle? Even once?
A moment while this realization sinks in.
ALLISON
No.
DIEGO
And your point?
LUTHER
That whoever has that monocle is
either the last person to see our
father alive, or the first one to
see him dead. I don’t care what
you thought of him, I really don’t.
(looks around)
What any of you thought. You wanna
hate his guts, fine, who gives a
shit. But we’re not gonna pretend
like this thing didn’t happen. We
owe Dad that much.
Diego stares at Luther. Then shakes his head.
DIEGO
Get help, Luther. Seriously.
(to the others:)
Number Five, enjoy puberty.
Allison: Good luck with that Best
Beach Bods of the Summer list. I
hear there’s some real fierce
competition this year.
(She gives him the
finger.)
Klaus--
Klaus shakes off his reverie and flashes a dazzling smile.
KLAUS
Are we leaving?
DIEGO
I’m leaving. By myself.
KLAUS
Lovely. I’ll get my things.
Klaus floats out of the room on his back. Diego glances back
at Luther and Allison. Then wordlessly exits the house.
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Scene 37 - Night Drive with Hallucinations
Diego climbs behind the wheel of his BLACK ‘72 CUTLASS
SUPREME CONVERTIBLE. He slams the door.
As he starts the car, Klaus LEVITATES into frame and settles
into the passenger seat. He smiles brightly at Diego.
KLAUS
I’ve been eating speed for the last
three days, and every time I close
my eyes I see centipedes.
Diego grimly turns the key. The car roars to life.
DIEGO
Fantastic.
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Scene 38 - Frustration and Freedom
Number Five angrily slams the pantry door.
NUMBER FIVE
Pogo, for the love of Christ, tell
me there’s coffee somewhere.
POGO
Your father didn’t believe in
caffeine.
NUMBER FIVE
Of course he didn’t.
The boy hops down, heads toward the garage.
NUMBER FIVE
I’m taking the Bentley into town.
ALLISON
Do you even know how to drive?
NUMBER FIVE
I know how to do everything.
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Scene 39 - Midnight Escape
Number Five hits the lights, revealing a garage stacked with
CLASSIC CARS. Jay Leno would be jealous.
He climbs behind the wheel of the Bentley. Attaches a WOOD
BLOCK to his right shoe to reach the pedals.
Guns the engine.
Grins.
EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - CONTINUOUS
The Bentley screams out of the garage. It swerves dangerously
onto the lawn, digging deep furrows into the grass, before
righting itself and speeding away into the night.
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Scene 40 - Under the Stars: A Moment of Connection
Allison climbs out her bedroom window onto the sloped roof.
She finds Luther, sitting alone, gazing up at the stars. He
holds up the EYE OF ANUBIS GEM, stares through it, breaking
the sky into a prism of competing constellations.
LUTHER
(noticing her)
You’re still here.
ALLISON
Just waiting on my car. Want some
company?
He scoots over slightly. She sits beside him. The MOON is
visible, a glowing crescent in a sea of darkness.
ALLISON
So what’s it like up there?
LUTHER
Quiet. Cold.
ALLISON
I wish I could see it. Maybe
someday you’ll take me up there
with you, huh?
LUTHER
Yeah. Maybe.
(beat)
Can I ask you something? I haven’t
seen you use your powers once since
I’ve been back.
ALLISON
Yeah, well. The last time...it
didn’t turn out so hot. Careful
what you wish for, blah blah blah.
(changing the subject)
How about you?
Luther is silent for a long moment.
LUTHER
I’m not stupid. I know things can
never go back to...you know. The
way they were.
(he looks at her)
But that doesn’t mean we can’t
still try. Father brought us
together for a reason--
ALLISON
He didn’t bring us together,
Luther. He took us from our homes.
From our real familes. He turned us
into this.
LUTHER
We’re still a family--
ALLISON
We’re an experiment. And not a very
good one.
Luther falls silent. Hangs his head. Far below, the mansion
gates swing open to admit a black STRETCH LIMOUSINE.
LUTHER
You should go.
ALLISON
You should come. I can show you
California. Do the whole Hollywood
sign, Disneyland thing.
He meets her gaze. Wants so badly to say yes. But instead:
LUTHER
You know I can’t.
ALLISON
Yeah. I know. Don’t stay gone
forever. The rest of us miss you
down here.
She stands. Kisses him on the forehead. Then climbs back
through the window, leaving Luther alone.
He stares at the ruby in his hand. Then he CLENCHES his fist,
as if trying to crush the gem into dust.
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Scene 41 - Reflections and Shadows
Allison gathers her luggage, starts for the door. Her gaze
falls on an old PHOTOGRAPH of the Umbrella Academy in its
prime. Seven smiling children, grinning and laughing.
She gazes at the image. Perhaps remembering how different
things were back then. How happy they were.
EXT. ALL-NIGHT DINER - NIGHT
The Bentley is parked (poorly) outside a cheap greasy spoon
diner. Number Five is already inside.
Several shadowy figures step out of the darkness. The
mysterious TEMP AGENTS we saw earlier.
They check their weapons. Then advance toward the diner.
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Scene 42 - Diner Showdown
The diner is mostly deserted: a handful of CUSTOMERS, a tired-
looking WAITRESS, a FRY COOK behind the grill. Number Five
sits at the counter, signals for the Waitress.
NUMBER FIVE
Coffee. Black.
WAITRESS
Ain’t you a little young for that?
NUMBER FIVE
Get me a goddamned cup of coffee or
I’ll burn this place to the ground.
(then, with effort:)
Please.
She stares at him for a long beat. Then, expressionless, she
pours a cup, slides it over to him. He drinks deeply.
WAITRESS
You got a mouth on you.
The boy just shows his teeth, like a feral chimpanzee. The
Waitress backs away, unnerved. He goes back to his coffee.
The bell dings. The Temps enter in the background.
The boy doesn’t turn. But somehow, he knows. He picks up his
BUTTER KNIFE, hides it from sight.
The Waitress gapes at the new arrivals. Customers scurry out
the back. The Fry Cook lowers himself out of sight.
The Temps stop behind Number Five. A beat.
LEAD TEMP
You don’t belong here.
NUMBER FIVE
Is that supposed to be a joke?
In the b.g., the Waitress and the remaining customers flee.
LEAD TEMP
We don’t want any trouble. We just
want you to finish the job.
He aims his PULSE RIFLE at the back of the boy’s skull.
LEAD TEMP
This doesn’t have to get messy.
Finally the boy swivels around on his stool. Surveys them.
NUMBER FIVE
You didn’t bring enough men for
“messy.”
The Lead Temp’s hand is shaking, ever so slightly.
Fuck it: he squeezes the trigger. The counter blows apart in
a spray of shrapnel--
But the boy is already gone, BLINKING out of existence--
And reappearing on the Lead Temp’s back. He PLUNGES the
butter knife into the agent’s neck--
The other Temps panic, open fire on their own boss, cutting
him to ribbons. Number Five blinks away again--
He reappears, SLIDING across the floor, right between the
legs of a Temp...plucking the man’s gun out of his ankle
holster...firing severals shots upward...BLAM! BLAM! BLAM!
BLINK! Number Five reappears in mid-air, parkour-bouncing off
the nearest wall, roundhouse kicking a Temp in the face--
BLINK! He reappears in the kitchen. One of the Temps opens
fire, spraying the kitchen with BLUE PLASMA--
BLINK! The boy appears, whipping a FRYING PAN like a discus--
SSSSHUNK! The handle of the frying pan IMPALES a Temp against
the wall, quivering in his forehead--
BLINK! BLINK! BLINK! The boy pops in and out of existence,
fighting hand-to-hand with two Temps simultaneously.
One of the Temps glances down and PANICS. All the grenades on
his bandolier have somehow been primed. BLINK! The boy
appears behind him, MULE KICKS the back of the Temp’s head...
Sends him pinwheeling headfirst into the second agent--
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Scene 43 - Aftermath of Chaos
WHUMP! A dull explosion lights up the interior of the diner.
Debris rains across the parking lot.
INT. ALL-NIGHT DINER - CONTINUOUS
In a matter of seconds, the entire diner has been reduced to
rubble. The floor slick with BLOOD and debris. FIRE spreading
along the walls. The air thick with toxic smoke.
Number Five picks his way through the carnage, drenched with
blood but otherwise untouched.
One last Temp agent is still clinging to life. Number Five
calmly takes the man’s head in the crook of his arm--
TEMP #1
waitwaitwaitwaitwait--!
Number Five brutally SNAPS his neck. The agent falls still.
The boy looks around, chest heaving, eyes feral.
NUMBER FIVE
ANYONE ELSE?
A section of the ceiling COLLAPSES behind him. The boy
doesn’t even flinch. He makes his way over to the window--
NUMBER FIVE’S POV: From an alley across the street, an
OMINOUS FIGURE watches the diner burn. Light reflects off the
man’s FRIGHTENING SKELETAL SILVER MASK.
Whoever he is, this dude is definitely bad news.
The boy’s eyes narrow--
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Scene 44 - Lost in the Shadows
BLINK! Number Five reappears in the diner’s parking lot,
skidding to a stop. He looks around wildly.
But the alleyway is empty. Skull Face is already gone.
Number Five turns in a slow, helpless circle. He can feel the
walls closing in around him. But what does it all mean?
END OF ACT FOUR
ACT FIVE
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Scene 45 - The Press Conference: Secrets of the Umbrella Academy
Our final FLASHBACK of the episode:
The hostage situation has ended. Reginald Hargreeves holds an
impromptu press conference outside the bank. The costumed
children--minus Vanya, of course--are lined up behind him.
A crowd of REPORTERS and TV CREWS jostle to get footage of
the kids. The world has never seen anything like them.
HARGREEVES
Our world is changing. There are
those who walk among us, gifted
with extraordinary abilities. The
Umbrella Academy is a place to
foster those abilities.
The Reporters begin to call out questions:
REPORTER #1
What happened to the parents?
HARGREEVES
They were suitably compensated.
REPORTER #2
What are their names?
HARGREEVES
One through Seven.
REPORTER #2
I only see six.
HARGREEVES
Then you can count. Next question.
REPORTER #3
Why are you doing this? I
mean...what’s the point?
HARGREEVES
The point?
REPORTER #3
Why did you adopt these kids?
HARGREEVES
To save the world, of course.
A beat.
REPORTER #3
Save it from what?
Hargreeves scans the crowd, his mood darkening.
HARGREEVES
No further questions.
We HARD CUT back to the present--
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Scene 46 - The Eye of Anubis Revelation
Luther sits alone in the darkened office. He spins the EYE OF
ANUBIS ruby, watches it clatter across the desk.
Suddenly he senses a change. Glances up sharply.
Allison stands in the doorway. Wearing her BLACK DOMINO MASK.
LUTHER
I really can’t get rid of you, can
I?
ALLISON
I figured...what the hell. Spaceboy
needs The Rumor, right?
Luther grins. Joy radiating across his broad face.
LUTHER
Yeah. He does.
(quieter)
Thanks.
ALLISON
Ehh. LA sucks this time of year.
Santa Anas. It’s a whole thing.
She approaches. Picks up the gem on the desk.
ALLISON
I know this. It’s the, uh...the
Egyptian thingie, yeah?
LUTHER
The Eye of Anubis. Apparently Dad
left it for me.
ALLISON
Hmm. He didn’t leave me shit.
(turning it in her hand)
ALLISON (CONT'D)
God, I haven’t seen this stuff in
years. Where’s all the rest of it?
TIGHT on Luther’s face, as he suddenly realizes...
LUTHER
The rest...
He bursts out of his chair. Allison calls after him:
ALLISON
Where are you going?
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Scene 47 - Awakening the Unknown
Luther opens the door to the basement storage room. Inside we
see CRUMBLING STATUES, scrap-metal AUTOMATONS, piles of
ancient UMBRELLA ACADEMY MERCHANDISE. Allison follows him
into the room, baffled.
ALLISON
Wanna tell me what’s going on?
LUTHER
Dad’s final wish was for me to have
that gem. Why would he do that?
Because he was, what, feeling
sentimental?
ALLISON
That...doesn’t sound like Dad.
LUTHER
Exactly. Which means there must
have been...
He whips away a tarp covering AN OLD EGYPTIAN STATUE. The god
Anubis. His eyes are staring black sockets.
LUTHER
...another reason.
Luther carefully fits the gem into the statue’s eye, twisting
it...suddenly it comes alive in his hands...ROTATING...
CHUNKA-CHUNKA-CHUNKA! We hear ancient gears GRINDING to life.
The floor SHUDDERS beneath their feet.
ALLISON
Oh God, if you just brought an evil
statue to life I’m gonna be so
pissed at you--
A section of the floor DROPS AWAY. They both leap back--
Now more stones begin to descend, forming a SPIRAL STAIRCASE,
leading downwards into darkness.
Allison meets Luther’s gaze. His face is shining with
excitement. It’s the first time we’ve seen him truly happy.
ALLISON
What...what’s down there?
LUTHER
I don’t know.
He gently takes her by the hand.
LUTHER
Let’s find out.
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Scene 48 - Vanya's Audition: A Moment of Truth
The same New York City concert hall we visited in the
prologue. Several JUDGES sit in the balcony, little more than
dim silhouettes. A YOUNG MAN plays the violin onstage.
The young man finishes his solo, bows stiffly. The lead judge
presses an intercom button, his voice AMPLIFIED:
JUDGE #1
Thank you.
The young man exits the stage. He is replaced by VANYA,
carrying her violin, her expression determined. She takes her
place in the spotlight.
VANYA
Vanya Hargreeves, auditioning for
first chair.
JUDGE #1
I’m sorry, Ms. Hargreeves? Didn’t
we see you already?
VANYA
This is where I belong.
She stares back at them with such intensity that the judges
don’t argue the point. After a moment, she begins to PLAY--
Her bow races across the strings. Eyes closed in
concentration. Fingers moving almost too fast to follow.
She’s not just good. She’s flawless.
The judges certainly think so. We can see them nodding,
whispering to each other. Slowly, we PAN DOWN to reveal--
There’s someone else eavesdropping on her audition. A shadowy
figure, watching from the back of the hall.
Light glints off his ominous SKULL-SHAPED MASK. It’s the same
mysterious figure we saw outside the all-night diner.
This is THE CONDUCTOR. And soon he will change the Umbrella
Academy forever.
Vanya doesn’t notice him. Too busy playing her heart out.
The Conductor listens raptly. One hand caresses the side of
his mask, as if wiping away an invisible tear.
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Scene 49 - Letting Go
Diego stands at the end of a rickety wooden pier, the waters
of the Hudson lapping against the dock. His convertible is
parked in the background, Klaus in the passenger seat.
Diego stares into the water, his expression conflicted.
Klaus, stoned out of his mind, HONKS the car horn. Meep-Meep.
KLAUS
Oh, Diego? Not trying to rush you
through whatever sort of weird
superhero brooding moment this is,
but I’d like to point out that I
was promised waffles, and thus far,
waffles have not been forthcoming.
Thus far.
Diego slowly opens his fist, revealing...
HARGREEVES’ MISSING SILVER MONOCLE.
LUTHER (V.O. FLASHBACK)
...whoever has that monocle is
either the last person to see our
father alive, or the first one to
see him dead.
Diego lets the monocle slip through his fingers. It vanishes
into the black water without so much as a splash.
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Scene 50 - A Disturbing Revelation
Vanya returns to her cozy little apartment, still on a high
after the best audition of her entire life. She places her
violin on the shelf. Hangs up her coat. Turns on the light.
Revealing NUMBER FIVE, calmly drinking a cup of coffee at her
kitchen table. He’s still streaked with DRIED BLOOD.
Vanya JUMPS, nearly screams--
VANYA
Jesus!
NUMBER FIVE
You should have locks on your
windows.
VANYA
I’m on the fifth floor.
NUMBER FIVE
Still.
VANYA
(looking closer)
Oh my God. Is that blood?
NUMBER FIVE
Don’t worry. It’s not mine.
VANYA
Yeah, not what I was worried about.
What are you doing here?
NUMBER FIVE
I’ve decided you’re the only one I
can trust.
VANYA
Why?
NUMBER FIVE
Because you’re ordinary.
He says it as a statement of fact, not an insult. Vanya sits.
NUMBER FIVE
When I jumped forward, into the
future, do you know what I found?
VANYA
No.
NUMBER FIVE
Nothing. Absolutely nothing.
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Scene 51 - Echoes of Desolation
Number Five wanders through a DESERTED CITY. There are BODIES
EVERYWHERE, desiccated, little more than skeletons. They’re
strewn on the sidewalk, slumped behind the wheel of their
cars, collapsed in their chairs at an outdoor cafe.
We can’t tell what killed them. But whatever it was, it
happened fast, and without warning.
NUMBER FIVE (V.O.)
As far as I could tell, I was the
last person left alive.
The boy stops, staring at a PLAYGROUND. There’s a tiny body
sprawled on the merry-go-round.
NUMBER FIVE (V.O.)
I never figured out what killed the
human race, or why. But I did find
something else.
Number Five approaches a CORNER NEWSSTAND. He picks up a
DAILY NEWSPAPER, ancient, brittle with age.
NUMBER FIVE (V.O.)
The date it happens.
INT. VANYA’S APARTMENT - CONTINUOUS
We RETURN TO THE PRESENT. The boy regards Vanya, his
expression solemn. Haunted. Hopeless.
NUMBER FIVE
The world ends in nine days. And I
have no idea how to stop it.
END OF PILOT
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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hargreeves | Throughout the pilot, Hargreeves begins as a distant and authoritarian figure, focused solely on training his children to harness their powers. As the story unfolds, cracks in his facade begin to show, revealing glimpses of vulnerability and the weight of his hidden agenda. By the end of the pilot, Hargreeves is forced to confront the consequences of his cold demeanor and the emotional toll it takes on his children. This confrontation leads him to a moment of self-reflection, where he must decide whether to continue his rigid approach or to acknowledge the emotional needs of his family, setting the stage for potential growth in future episodes. | While Hargreeves is portrayed as a compelling and complex character, his arc in the pilot may feel somewhat one-dimensional if not developed further. The initial portrayal of his coldness and authority could risk alienating the audience, making it difficult for viewers to empathize with him. Additionally, the hidden agenda aspect, while intriguing, may need clearer motivations to avoid confusion about his ultimate goals. | To improve Hargreeves' character arc, consider incorporating moments that reveal his backstory and the reasons behind his cold demeanor. Flashbacks or interactions with other characters could provide context for his strictness and hidden agenda, allowing the audience to understand his motivations better. Additionally, introducing a pivotal moment where he must choose between his mission and the well-being of his children could create a more dynamic and relatable character. This internal conflict would not only enhance his arc but also engage the audience emotionally, making them invested in his journey. |
vanya | Throughout the pilot, Vanya's character arc centers on her struggle with self-identity and her desire for connection within her dysfunctional family. Initially portrayed as fragile and overlooked, her discovery of Reginald Hargreeves' death serves as a catalyst for her emotional turmoil. As she confronts her feelings of isolation and inadequacy, Vanya begins to find her voice and assert her presence within the family dynamic. By the end of the pilot, she starts to embrace her musical talent as a source of strength, setting the stage for her transformation into a more confident and empowered individual who seeks to reclaim her place in the world and her family. | Vanya's character arc is compelling, as it captures the essence of her internal struggles and emotional depth. However, the arc could benefit from clearer moments of growth and transformation throughout the pilot. While her vulnerability is well-established, the transition to her finding strength and confidence feels somewhat abrupt. The emotional stakes could be heightened by incorporating more direct interactions with her siblings that challenge her self-perception and push her towards growth. | To improve Vanya's character arc, consider adding pivotal scenes that showcase her gradual evolution. For instance, include moments where she stands up for herself in conversations with her siblings, or instances where her music becomes a powerful expression of her emotions, leading to breakthroughs in her relationships. Additionally, introducing a mentor or ally who recognizes her potential could provide a supportive dynamic that encourages her growth. This would create a more nuanced and satisfying progression from fragility to empowerment, making her eventual transformation feel earned and impactful. |
allison | Allison's character arc in the pilot revolves around her journey from a protective and skeptical sibling to a more open and reconciliatory figure within her family. Initially, she is defensive and confrontational, struggling with her family's dysfunction and her own past. As the story progresses, she begins to confront her own fears and insecurities, ultimately realizing the importance of vulnerability and connection. By the end of the pilot, Allison learns to balance her protective instincts with empathy, allowing her to forge deeper relationships with her siblings and embrace her own identity beyond the shadows of her past. | While Allison's character is rich and layered, her arc could benefit from clearer stakes and a more defined transformation. The pilot introduces various aspects of her personality, but it may feel overwhelming for the audience to fully grasp her journey without a more focused narrative. Additionally, her interactions with other characters could be more varied to showcase different facets of her personality and how they evolve throughout the pilot. | To improve Allison's character arc, consider establishing a central conflict that directly challenges her beliefs about family and identity. This could involve a pivotal event that forces her to confront her past and her relationship with her siblings. Additionally, incorporating moments of vulnerability where she opens up about her struggles could create a more relatable and engaging character. Finally, ensure that her growth is reflected in her interactions with others, showcasing a gradual shift from skepticism to acceptance and connection, which will resonate more deeply with the audience. |
klaus | Throughout the pilot, Klaus begins as a carefree and humorous character, using levity to mask his deeper emotional struggles. As the story progresses, he is confronted with the realities of his family's challenges and the supernatural events surrounding them. This forces Klaus to confront his past traumas and the pain he has been avoiding. By the end of the pilot, Klaus starts to open up to his siblings, revealing his vulnerabilities and seeking genuine connections, ultimately leading to a more grounded and emotionally aware version of himself. His journey reflects a balance between maintaining his quirky humor while also embracing the seriousness of his circumstances. | Klaus's character arc is engaging, but it risks becoming one-dimensional if he remains solely the comic relief without deeper exploration of his emotional struggles. While his humor is a significant aspect of his personality, the pilot should ensure that his vulnerabilities are given enough screen time to resonate with the audience. The balance between his levity and the gravity of his past needs to be carefully managed to avoid undermining the emotional stakes of the story. | To improve Klaus's character arc, consider incorporating moments where his humor fails him, leading to genuine emotional breakdowns or confrontations with his siblings. This could create a more dynamic character who is not only funny but also relatable and complex. Additionally, introducing a subplot that directly ties Klaus's past trauma to the supernatural events could provide a stronger motivation for his character development. Allowing Klaus to take on a more active role in resolving conflicts, rather than just providing comic relief, would enhance his significance in the narrative and deepen his relationships with other characters. |
diego | Throughout the pilot, Diego begins as a rebellious and confrontational figure, driven by a desire to protect his family while simultaneously pushing them away. His impulsive nature leads him into conflict with both authority figures and his siblings, particularly as he grapples with the return of Number Five. As the story progresses, Diego faces a pivotal moment that forces him to confront his internal struggles and the consequences of his actions. By the end of the pilot, he begins to recognize the importance of unity and trust within his family, setting the stage for his growth as a character who learns to balance his fierce independence with the need for collaboration and understanding. | Diego's character arc is compelling, but it risks becoming one-dimensional if not developed further. While his rebellious nature and confrontational style are engaging, the pilot should delve deeper into his internal conflicts and motivations. The audience needs to see more of his vulnerabilities and the reasons behind his distrust of authority and family. Additionally, the interactions with his siblings could be expanded to showcase the complexity of their relationships, allowing for more emotional depth and growth. | To improve Diego's character arc, consider incorporating flashbacks or moments of reflection that reveal his past experiences and the roots of his skepticism and aggression. Introduce a subplot that challenges his views on family and authority, perhaps through a significant event that forces him to rely on his siblings. This could create opportunities for meaningful dialogue and character development. Additionally, showcasing moments of camaraderie or shared vulnerability with his siblings could help balance his tough exterior and make his eventual growth more impactful. |
luther | Luther's character arc in the pilot begins with him as the de facto leader, burdened by the expectations of his father's legacy and the grief of his loss. Initially, he is protective but emotionally detached, struggling to express his feelings and doubts about the circumstances of his father's death. As the story progresses, Luther's journey leads him to confront his inner conflicts, including trust issues and feelings of betrayal. He begins to open up, particularly in his interactions with his siblings, revealing his vulnerabilities and the weight of his responsibilities. By the end of the pilot, Luther evolves from a stoic figure into a more emotionally aware character, willing to embrace his vulnerabilities and seek genuine connections with his family, setting the stage for further development in future episodes. | Luther's character arc is compelling, but it risks becoming too predictable if not handled with nuance. While his internal struggles are well-defined, the pilot could benefit from more dynamic interactions with other characters that challenge his views and force him to confront his emotions more directly. Additionally, the pacing of his emotional evolution may feel rushed if not balanced with moments of tension and conflict that highlight his growth. | To improve Luther's character arc, consider incorporating more moments of conflict that force him to confront his beliefs and emotions head-on. Introduce a subplot that challenges his authority or forces him to make difficult choices that reveal his vulnerabilities. Additionally, allow for more varied interactions with his siblings that showcase different facets of his personality, such as humor or frustration, to create a more rounded character. Finally, ensure that his emotional journey is paced gradually, allowing viewers to witness his transformation in a believable and engaging manner. |
pogo | Throughout the pilot, Pogo's character arc revolves around his role as a stabilizing force for the siblings while grappling with his own feelings of nostalgia and loss. Initially, he is seen as a supportive figure, providing wisdom and comfort. However, as the siblings confront their past and the challenges of their present, Pogo must also confront his own regrets and the limitations of his guidance. By the end of the pilot, he evolves from merely being a caretaker to a more active participant in the family's journey, realizing that he must also embrace change and adapt to the evolving dynamics of the family. | Pogo's character is well-defined as a source of wisdom and support, but his arc could benefit from deeper emotional stakes. While he provides guidance, the pilot does not fully explore his personal struggles or the impact of the family's issues on him. This could make him feel more relatable and multidimensional. Additionally, his role as a mentor could be challenged more significantly, allowing for moments of vulnerability that would enhance his character development. | To improve Pogo's character arc, consider incorporating scenes that reveal his personal history and the sacrifices he has made for the family. This could include flashbacks or conversations that highlight his regrets and desires. Additionally, introduce a conflict where Pogo's guidance is questioned by the siblings, forcing him to confront his own limitations and adapt his approach. This would create a more dynamic character who not only supports others but also grows and learns from the challenges they face together. |
young allison | Throughout the pilot, Young Allison evolves from a curious and rebellious child into a courageous leader who embraces her powers and responsibilities. Initially, she uses her persuasive abilities to navigate her world, often challenging authority figures. As the story progresses, she faces a life-threatening situation that tests her bravery and resourcefulness. By the end of the pilot, she not only saves lives but also begins to understand the importance of her powers and the impact she can have on others. This pivotal moment marks her transition from a self-focused individual to a compassionate hero who is willing to stand up for justice and protect those in need. | While Young Allison's character is well-developed and showcases a strong moral compass, her arc could benefit from deeper emotional exploration. The pilot presents her as brave and resourceful, but it lacks moments that delve into her vulnerabilities and fears. This could create a more relatable character and allow the audience to connect with her on a deeper level. Additionally, the stakes could be raised further to emphasize her growth and the consequences of her actions. | To improve Young Allison's character arc, consider incorporating scenes that highlight her internal struggles and fears, particularly regarding her powers and the responsibilities that come with them. This could involve moments of doubt or conflict with her peers or authority figures, allowing her to grapple with the weight of her choices. Additionally, introducing a mentor figure or a close friend who challenges her perspective could provide opportunities for growth and reflection. Finally, enhancing the stakes of her confrontations with villains could further emphasize her transformation and the significance of her journey. |
young vanya | Throughout the pilot, Young Vanya's character arc revolves around her struggle for identity and acceptance within a family that overlooks her. Initially, she is defiant and assertive, challenging her father's authority and expressing her desire to be recognized as an individual. However, as she faces rejection from her father and siblings, her confidence begins to wane, leading her to a place of sadness and longing for validation. By the end of the pilot, Vanya's journey hints at a turning point where she begins to understand the importance of self-acceptance, setting the stage for her eventual transformation into a more empowered version of herself, capable of embracing her unique identity. | While Young Vanya's character arc is compelling, it risks becoming overly reliant on her feelings of rejection and sadness without sufficient development of her assertive qualities. The pilot may benefit from showcasing more moments where Vanya's defiance leads to positive outcomes or connections with her siblings, rather than solely focusing on her isolation. This would create a more balanced portrayal of her character and highlight her resilience in the face of adversity. | To improve Young Vanya's character arc, consider incorporating scenes that allow her to demonstrate her assertiveness in a way that fosters connection rather than isolation. For example, she could take initiative in a family crisis, showcasing her bravery and intelligence, which could earn her some recognition from her siblings. Additionally, introducing a mentor figure or a supportive sibling who acknowledges her strengths could provide a counterbalance to her father's neglect, helping to build her confidence. This would create a more dynamic arc that emphasizes growth and resilience, making her eventual journey toward self-acceptance even more impactful. |
number five | Throughout the pilot, Number Five evolves from a detached and somewhat arrogant time traveler into a more grounded and emotionally aware individual. Initially, he is focused solely on the mission at hand, displaying a ruthless efficiency that alienates him from others. As the story progresses, he confronts the emotional weight of his past and the consequences of his actions, leading to moments of vulnerability and connection with his family. By the end of the pilot, he begins to understand the importance of teamwork and emotional bonds, setting the stage for further growth in future episodes as he learns to balance his strategic mindset with the need for human connection. | While Number Five's character is intriguing and multifaceted, the pilot could benefit from a clearer exploration of his emotional journey. His initial portrayal as detached and arrogant may alienate viewers, making it challenging to empathize with him. Additionally, the balance between his confident demeanor and moments of vulnerability needs to be more pronounced to create a compelling character arc that resonates with the audience. | To improve Number Five's character arc, consider incorporating more scenes that showcase his internal struggles and the impact of his past on his present behavior. Introducing flashbacks or dialogue that reveals his emotional scars could deepen the audience's understanding of his motivations. Additionally, creating opportunities for him to form connections with other characters, particularly his family, would enhance his growth and make his eventual transformation more impactful. Finally, ensuring that his moments of vulnerability are juxtaposed with his confident exterior will create a more dynamic and relatable character. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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High Emotional Impact Scenes and Dialogue | Scenes with high emotional impact scores (above 8) consistently have high dialogue scores (above 7), suggesting a strong correlation between impactful storytelling and well-written dialogue. This is particularly notable in scenes 2, 5, 7, 8, 23, 26, 27, 29, 30, 32 and 34. Consider leveraging this strength to further enhance emotional resonance in other scenes. |
Tone and Emotional Impact | Tense, suspenseful, and mysterious tones (frequently present) generally correlate with higher emotional impact scores. However, reflective and nostalgic tones (scenes 14, 15, 20, 21, 35, 40, 50) tend to have lower emotional impact, possibly indicating a need to elevate the emotional stakes in those reflective moments. Experiment with intensifying the character's internal conflicts or external pressures during these scenes. |
Concept and Plot Strength | Scenes with high concept scores (above 8) are often paired with strong plot scores, suggesting a strong foundational structure. However, scenes 11 and 28 show weaker plot scores despite decent concepts, highlighting potential areas for plot tightening. Focus on developing compelling plot points within the established conceptual framework to improve these scenes. |
Character Development and High Stakes | While many scenes show good character development, the correlation between strong character arcs and high-stakes situations is not always present. This is particularly noticeable in scenes 11 and 35, where character development is good, but high-stakes are lacking. Consider adding elements of increased risk or consequences to enhance tension and engagement in those scenarios. |
Humor and Emotional Impact | The inclusion of humor, especially in tense or mysterious scenes (23, 24, 29, 32, 34), appears to enhance emotional impact. This is an effective juxtaposition that could be explored more systematically to create more unpredictable and engaging scenes. |
Reflective Scenes and Emotional Impact | Scenes with reflective tones (14, 15, 20, 21, 35, 40, 50) consistently have lower emotional impact and dialogue scores compared to tense or mysterious scenes. This indicates a possible weakness in leveraging reflective scenes for emotional payoff. Consider adding more internal conflict, vulnerability or meaningful dialogue to these scenes to increase their impact. |
Scene 11: An Outlier | Scene 11 stands out significantly as a low point across most metrics (Emotional Impact, Conflict, High Stakes, Move story forward). It significantly disrupts the overall flow. This scene needs a complete overhaul to improve the story's pacing and emotional impact. Analyze its purpose and consider how to revitalize it, possibly by incorporating elements from stronger scenes. |
Supernatural Elements and Emotional Impact | The introduction of supernatural elements (scenes 22, 33, 34) tends to boost the emotional impact and overall intrigue, suggesting their effective use in raising stakes. |
Final Scenes: High Stakes, but Lower Dialogue | While the final scenes (50 and 51) maintain high stakes, they show a relative drop in dialogue scores. This could suggest a reliance on visual storytelling at the climax, potentially needing more verbalization of internal conflict or character revelations to fully maximize their impact. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates a strong foundation in storytelling, consistently showcasing the ability to create engaging narratives with compelling characters and well-defined conflicts. The writer exhibits skill in establishing mood, tension, and mystery across various scenes. However, there's a recurring need for refinement in specific craft elements such as dialogue, pacing, and character development, which could elevate the scenes from good to exceptional. The scenes show potential in diverse genres, indicating adaptability and a versatile storytelling approach.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This is repeatedly suggested and addresses pacing, structure, and character arc—key areas for improvement identified in the analysis. It provides a practical framework for structuring scenes and building compelling narratives. |
Book | 'Save the Cat! Writes a Novel' by Jessica Brody | This complements 'Save the Cat!' by extending the principles to novel-length stories and providing more in-depth guidance on character development and plot structure. |
Screenplay Study | Analyze screenplays by Aaron Sorkin (for sharp dialogue and pacing), Christopher Nolan (for complex narratives and genre blending), Charlie Kaufman (for emotional depth and character-driven storytelling), and David Mamet (for subtext and dialogue). | These writers represent different strengths relevant to the writer's needs: sharp dialogue, complex plots, emotional depth, and subtext. By studying their scripts, the writer can learn techniques to improve their work in these specific areas. |
Video | Watch video essays and tutorials on screenwriting techniques, focusing on dialogue, pacing, and character development. | Visual learning aids can provide a supplemental learning approach, offering practical demonstrations and analysis of successful screenplays. |
Workshop | Attend a screenwriting workshop or find a writing group for feedback and guidance. | Receiving constructive criticism from other writers and instructors can offer valuable insights and help improve areas not addressed through self-study. |
Stories Similar to this one
Story | Explanation |
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The Umbrella Academy | Both the screenplay and 'The Umbrella Academy' feature a dysfunctional family of siblings with superpowers who grapple with their past and the death of their father. The themes of family dynamics, emotional turmoil, and the exploration of identity are central to both narratives. |
The Handmaid's Tale | Set in a dystopian society, 'The Handmaid's Tale' shares themes of female oppression and societal control, similar to the mysterious births and the mob's reaction in the screenplay. Both stories explore the struggles of women in a patriarchal context and the consequences of societal expectations. |
The Giver | In 'The Giver,' a seemingly idyllic society hides dark secrets, much like the picturesque Polish village that conceals the alarming births. Both narratives explore themes of conformity, the loss of individuality, and the quest for truth in a controlled environment. |
Children of Men | Both stories involve themes of unexpected births in a world filled with chaos and despair. 'Children of Men' depicts a future where humanity faces extinction, paralleling the mysterious births in the screenplay that provoke fear and curiosity among the villagers. |
The Secret Garden | The exploration of a hidden, magical space in 'The Secret Garden' resonates with the themes of discovery and emotional healing found in the screenplay. Both narratives involve characters confronting their pasts and finding solace in unexpected places. |
The Babadook | Both stories delve into the psychological struggles of their protagonists, with the screenplay's teenage mother facing societal pressures and personal turmoil. 'The Babadook' explores themes of grief and motherhood, paralleling the emotional weight carried by the characters in the screenplay. |
The Witch | Set in a rural community with a strong sense of superstition and fear, 'The Witch' shares the atmosphere of tension and paranoia present in the screenplay. Both narratives explore themes of isolation, societal judgment, and the supernatural. |
The Virgin Suicides | Both stories focus on the lives of young women facing societal pressures and emotional struggles. 'The Virgin Suicides' explores themes of isolation, family dynamics, and the impact of societal expectations, similar to the teenage girl's experience in the screenplay. |
The Others | In 'The Others,' the themes of isolation, fear, and the supernatural are prevalent, akin to the mysterious and eerie atmosphere of the Polish village in the screenplay. Both narratives involve characters confronting their fears and the unknown. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Chosen One | Vanya is portrayed as the ordinary sibling among extraordinary siblings, hinting at her potential significance. | This trope involves a character who is destined to fulfill a great purpose or has unique abilities that set them apart. An example is Neo from 'The Matrix,' who is 'the One' destined to save humanity. |
Family Dysfunction | The Hargreeves siblings struggle with their relationships and unresolved issues stemming from their upbringing. | This trope highlights the complexities and conflicts within a family unit. A well-known example is 'The Royal Tenenbaums,' where family members grapple with their past and each other. |
The Mentor | Reginald Hargreeves serves as a cold and authoritative figure, guiding the siblings but also causing emotional turmoil. | The mentor trope involves a character who provides guidance and training to the protagonist. An example is Mr. Miyagi from 'The Karate Kid,' who teaches Daniel both martial arts and life lessons. |
The Hero's Journey | Vanya's journey from feeling ordinary to discovering her potential mirrors the classic hero's journey. | This trope outlines a character's adventure, growth, and transformation. An example is Frodo in 'The Lord of the Rings,' who embarks on a quest that changes him profoundly. |
The Loveable Rogue | Klaus embodies this trope with his carefree attitude and questionable choices, often providing comic relief. | This trope features a charming character who breaks rules but has a good heart. An example is Han Solo from 'Star Wars,' who is a smuggler with a heroic side. |
The Mysterious Past | The siblings' backstories and their father's secrets create an air of mystery throughout the narrative. | |
The Gathering of Heroes | The siblings come together to confront their father's death and the mysteries surrounding it. | This trope involves a group of characters uniting for a common cause. An example is 'The Avengers,' where superheroes join forces to save the world. |
The Unlikely Friendship | Vanya's bond with Pogo, the caretaker, showcases an unexpected yet heartfelt connection. | This trope highlights friendships that form between unlikely pairs. An example is the relationship between E.T. and Elliott in 'E.T. the Extra-Terrestrial.' |
The Prophecy | Hints of a larger threat and Vanya's potential role in it suggest a prophetic element. | This trope involves a foretelling of events that characters must navigate. An example is the prophecy in 'Harry Potter' regarding Harry and Voldemort. |
The Dark and Stormy Night | The screenplay opens with a violent thunderstorm, setting a dramatic tone. | This trope uses weather to reflect the mood or foreshadow events. An example is the opening of 'The Wizard of Oz,' where a storm leads to Dorothy's adventure. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||||||||||||
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Dysfunctional Family Dynamics | The siblings of the Umbrella Academy, despite their shared traumatic upbringing and extraordinary powers, exhibit significant interpersonal conflict, rivalry, and unresolved emotional baggage stemming from their father's manipulative and neglectful parenting style. Their interactions are marked by mistrust, anger, and a struggle to connect on an emotional level. | This theme explores the lasting impact of a broken family structure, highlighting the challenges of sibling relationships burdened by trauma, expectations, and the absence of genuine affection and support. The dysfunction serves as a catalyst for many of the plot's conflicts. | ||||||||||||
Strengthening Dysfunctional Family Dynamics:
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The Search for Identity and Belonging | Each sibling grapples with their unique identity, struggling to reconcile their extraordinary abilities with their perceived ordinariness. Vanya, in particular, searches for acceptance and recognition, while others wrestle with the expectations imposed upon them by their father and their roles within the Umbrella Academy. | This theme delves into the universal human need to find one's place in the world and belong to a community. The siblings' journey toward self-discovery underscores the importance of self-acceptance and the challenges of finding one's true identity amidst external pressures. | ||||||||||||
The Legacy of Trauma and Abuse | The harsh and unorthodox training methods employed by Reginald Hargreeves leave lasting psychological scars on his children, manifesting as emotional detachment, self-destructive behaviors, and a pervasive sense of inadequacy. The siblings' struggles are directly linked to their traumatic childhood experiences and the emotional manipulation inflicted upon them by their father. | This theme explores the long-term consequences of emotional and psychological abuse, showing how childhood trauma can shape adult relationships and behaviors. The story highlights the difficulty of overcoming past traumas and the importance of seeking healing and reconciliation. | ||||||||||||
The Nature of Family and Love | Despite the considerable dysfunction, the siblings' shared history and bond create moments of tenderness, loyalty, and unexpected support. Their relationship is complex and contradictory, illustrating the messy, powerful, and often unpredictable nature of family ties. | This theme explores the various forms that love can take within a family, showcasing the enduring power of familial bonds even in the face of adversity and dysfunction. It questions what defines family and the conditions under which true love can flourish. | ||||||||||||
The Burden of Extraordinary Abilities | The siblings' unique powers are not always gifts; they frequently become a source of burden, isolation, and danger. The characters must learn to control their abilities and find ways to use them responsibly while navigating the moral and ethical dilemmas inherent in wielding such power. | This theme explores the complexities of possessing extraordinary capabilities and the challenges of integrating such abilities into everyday life. It questions the responsibility that comes with power and the potential for misuse. | ||||||||||||
Mystery and Intrigue Surrounding the Father's Death | The unexpected death of Reginald Hargreeves sparks suspicion among the siblings, who question the circumstances surrounding his passing. The mystery surrounding his death drives much of the plot's central conflict and compels the siblings to confront unresolved issues within their family. | This theme adds a layer of suspense and intrigue to the narrative, prompting the audience to question the truth and the motivations of various characters. It highlights the importance of investigating and questioning seemingly obvious conclusions. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by a compelling blend of dark humor, intense action, and emotional depth. There's a strong focus on dysfunctional family dynamics, exploring complex relationships marked by both affection and resentment. The narrative frequently juxtaposes moments of high stakes and visceral action with introspective character moments and witty banter, creating a unique tone that is both gripping and emotionally resonant. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by creating a darkly compelling atmosphere. The blend of humor and suspense keeps the audience engaged, while the exploration of complex familial relationships adds emotional depth and thematic richness. The vivid imagery and sensory details in descriptions, coupled with sharp, revealing dialogue, make the world of the Umbrella Academy feel palpable and incredibly real, despite its fantastical elements. This contributes to a strong sense of both mystery and intimacy. |
Best Representation Scene | 17 - Family Secrets Unveiled |
Best Scene Explanation | Scene 17 best encapsulates the writer's voice because it perfectly balances the key elements of their style. The scene features sharp, revealing dialogue that highlights the complex relationships between the siblings, showcasing both their affection and deep-seated resentments. The underlying tension and suspense, fueled by the mystery surrounding their father's death, is masterfully interwoven with Klaus's darkly humorous interjections, creating a scene that is both emotionally resonant and grippingly suspenseful. It showcases the writer's ability to create a dynamic and engaging scene that explores the central themes of family, loss, and mystery. |
- Overall originality score: 8.5
- Overall originality explanation: The screenplay showcases a high level of originality through its unique blend of genres, including elements of steampunk, superhero narratives, and family dynamics. The incorporation of supernatural abilities, complex character relationships, and imaginative settings contributes to a fresh and engaging narrative. Each scene introduces distinct and intriguing situations, such as the simultaneous births around the world, the malfunctioning automatons, and the juxtaposition of Vanya's audition with the chaotic home invasion, all of which enhance the screenplay's originality.
- Most unique situations: The most unique situations in the screenplay are the simultaneous global births that create a sense of mystery, the introduction of a vigilante character using extreme violence to protect others, and the imaginative depiction of a post-apocalyptic world filled with remnants of humanity. Additionally, the use of a talking chimpanzee and the exploration of family dynamics through supernatural elements further set the screenplay apart.
- Overall unpredictability score: 8
- Overall unpredictability explanation: The screenplay maintains a strong sense of unpredictability through its unexpected character developments and plot twists. The introduction of supernatural elements, such as time travel and the chaotic consequences of the characters' actions, keeps the audience guessing. The emotional conflicts among the siblings, particularly regarding their father's death and the implications of their past, add layers of complexity that contribute to the unpredictability of the narrative. The combination of humor, tension, and dark themes ensures that the audience remains engaged and uncertain about the characters' fates.
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internal Goals | The protagonist's internal goals evolve from seeking recognition and belonging to confronting her insecurities and understanding her family's complexities. Vanya desires acceptance and validation for her music, grapples with her feelings of isolation, and ultimately strives for self-acceptance and understanding of her powers. |
External Goals | The protagonist's external goals shift from proving herself in a competitive environment to protecting her family and ultimately confronting the impending apocalypse. Vanya navigates her audition, seeks to connect with her siblings, and comes to understand the larger stakes involving their family's legacy and its connection to the world's fate. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict centers on the tensions between individuality and familial expectations, as Vanya struggles to assert her identity against the backdrop of her family's extraordinary legacy. This conflict intertwines with her journey as she seeks to define herself outside of her family's shadow while reconciling with her past. |
Character Development Contribution: The evolution of Vanya's goals and the philosophical conflicts she faces contribute significantly to her character development, enabling her to move from a position of insecurity and isolation to one of empowerment and self-acceptance, fostering deeper connections with her family.
Narrative Structure Contribution: These elements create a compelling narrative structure that builds tension around Vanya's internal and external struggles, propelling the storyline through her pivotal moments of confrontation, self-discovery, and the resolution of family dynamics.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The interplay of goals and conflicts deepens the themes of identity, belonging, and familial ties, highlighting the importance of self-discovery amidst external pressures and the complexity of navigating relationships within a fractured family dynamic.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
- Physical environment: The screenplay's physical environment is multifaceted, ranging from a quaint Polish village in 1984 to a modern-day New York City, a futuristic mansion resembling a blend of NASA's Jet Propulsion Laboratory and the X-Men's Danger Room, a desolate lunar landscape, a vibrant Amsterdam rave club, a decaying gothic mansion, seedy diners, and a post-apocalyptic city. This variety creates a visually diverse world.
- Culture: Cultural elements are varied and significant. The film depicts the close-knit community of a Polish village in the 1980s, contrasting it with the celebrity culture of Hollywood and the high-stakes world of classical music. The subculture of a rave scene is also shown, contrasting sharply with the austere environment of the Umbrella Academy. The culture of fame, wealth, and the music industry are explored. There's also a subtle blend of historical (1980s Poland) and futuristic (steampunk dirigibles, advanced weaponry, time travel) elements.
- Society: The societal structures presented are complex and often dysfunctional. We see the close-knit but gossipy community of the Polish village; the hierarchical and secretive structure of the Umbrella Academy, with its powerful, sometimes abusive patriarch; the glamorous but isolating world of celebrity; the vulnerability of families to home invasion; the chaotic scenes of a bank robbery and its aftermath; and, ultimately, a post-apocalyptic world. The family dynamics within the Umbrella Academy are a central societal structure, characterized by dysfunction, rivalry, and hidden resentments.
- Technology: Technology ranges from minimal (1980s Poland) to highly advanced (futuristic mansion training rooms, time travel, steam-powered dirigibles, futuristic weaponry). The contrast between these levels of technological advancement highlights the disparity between different aspects of the world and underscores the characters' diverse experiences. The juxtaposition of advanced technology with more primitive settings emphasizes the incongruities and anxieties of a world rapidly changing (or already changed).
- Characters influence: The world profoundly shapes the characters' experiences and actions. The close-knit village community influences the reactions to the mysterious births, the high-stakes world of music pressures Vanya, the pressures of fame isolate Allison, and the dysfunctional family dynamics of the Umbrella Academy drive the conflicts between the siblings. The advanced technology available to Hargreeves and the Academy shapes their training and their mission, highlighting the ethical considerations of using advanced technology and the cost of this power.
- Narrative contribution: The diverse settings and technological advancements create a compelling narrative that seamlessly blends genres. The contrast between the idyllic Polish village and the high-tech mansion, the rave and the moon, serves to highlight the thematic contrasts in the story. The varied locations provide a dynamic backdrop for the unfolding events, adding visual interest and enhancing the dramatic tension.
- Thematic depth contribution: The varied world-building elements significantly contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by creating a complex interplay of themes: family dynamics, the nature of power, the burden of extraordinary abilities, the contrast between innocence and corruption, the search for belonging, and the consequences of ambition. The juxtaposition of contrasting environments and levels of technology enhances the exploration of these themes, making them richer and more nuanced.
central conflict
The central conflict revolves around the mysterious circumstances surrounding the death of Reginald Hargreeves and the siblings' struggle to uncover the truth while grappling with their dysfunctional family dynamics.
primary motivations
- The siblings seek to understand their father's death and its implications.
- Vanya desires acceptance and recognition within her family.
- Number Five is motivated by a sense of urgency to prevent a looming threat he senses.
- Allison seeks to reconnect with her siblings and find her place in the family.
catalysts
- The sudden death of Reginald Hargreeves acts as the primary catalyst for the siblings' reunion.
- The appearance of Number Five after years of absence introduces urgency and mystery.
- The discovery of the missing monocle and the Eye of Anubis gem prompts further investigation.
barriers
- The siblings' unresolved emotional issues and past traumas hinder their ability to work together.
- Mistrust among the siblings creates obstacles in their investigation.
- External threats from the Temps Aeternalis complicate their efforts.
themes
- Family dysfunction and the struggle for acceptance.
- The burden of legacy and the quest for identity.
- The impact of trauma on relationships and personal growth.
- The nature of heroism and the consequences of power.
stakes
The stakes include the potential unraveling of the family unit, the threat of an impending apocalypse, and the fate of the siblings as they confront their past and future.
uniqueness factor
The story uniquely blends elements of superhero narratives with deep psychological exploration of family dynamics and personal identity.
audience hook
The combination of supernatural abilities, family drama, and the mystery surrounding their father's death keeps viewers engaged.
paradoxical engine or bisociation
The paradoxical engine lies in the juxtaposition of the siblings' extraordinary powers against their ordinary familial struggles, creating tension between their heroic identities and personal vulnerabilities.
paradoxical engine or bisociation 2
Another bisociation could be the contrast between the whimsical, fantastical elements of their upbringing and the dark, tragic realities they face as adults, highlighting the dissonance between childhood innocence and adult responsibilities.
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for the TV pilot of 'The Umbrella Academy' is a compelling and well-crafted piece that blends elements of superhero, sci-fi, and family drama. The story follows the estranged members of the Umbrella Academy, a group of adopted siblings with extraordinary abilities, as they reunite after the death of their father, Reginald Hargreeves. The pilot introduces the main characters and sets up a compelling mystery surrounding Hargreeves' demise, while also hinting at a looming apocalyptic threat. With its strong character development, engaging plot, and unique stylistic choices, the script showcases the writer's skill and the potential for a captivating TV series.
- The screenplay effectively introduces the diverse members of the Umbrella Academy through a series of well-crafted vignettes that showcase their unique abilities and personalities. This creates a strong foundation for the ensemble cast and sets the stage for their eventual reunion. high ( Scene 6 Scene 7 )
- The script provides insightful character development for Luther and Allison, two of the Umbrella Academy's siblings, through their interactions and reflections on their shared past. This helps to establish the complex relationships and personal struggles within the family. high ( Scene 13 Scene 16 )
- The action sequence in the all-night diner, where Number Five showcases his impressive time-traveling abilities in a brutal fight against the mysterious Temps Aeternalis agents, is a visually striking and thrilling set piece that demonstrates the writer's skill in crafting engaging action scenes. high ( Scene 42 )
- The final scene, where Vanya excels at her audition while a sinister figure known as the Conductor watches, sets up an intriguing mystery and hints at the larger supernatural elements at play in the story. high ( Scene 48 )
- The reveal of Number Five's time-traveling experiences and the impending apocalypse he has witnessed adds a sense of urgency and high stakes to the narrative, effectively raising the dramatic tension and setting up the central conflict for the series. high ( Scene 50 Scene 51 )
- The confrontation between Vanya, Allison, and Diego could be further developed to delve deeper into the siblings' complex relationships and the lingering resentments they hold towards one another. medium ( Scene 12 )
- The discussion around Reginald Hargreeves' death and the potential murder investigation could be more tightly woven throughout the episode, creating a stronger sense of narrative cohesion. medium ( Scene 17 )
- Vanya's decision to leave the Umbrella Academy and the emotional impact on the other siblings could be further explored, providing a more nuanced and impactful character arc for her. medium ( Scene 35 )
- The screenplay could benefit from more explicit world-building and background information on the Umbrella Academy's history and the scope of the siblings' abilities, to help ground the audience in the unique setting and dynamics of the story. medium ( Scene )
- The screenplay could explore the relationships and dynamics between the Umbrella Academy siblings in more depth, particularly the interpersonal conflicts and unresolved issues that have driven them apart over the years. medium ( Scene )
- The opening sequence that introduces the concept of the 43 children born simultaneously and Reginald Hargreeves' subsequent efforts to adopt them is an intriguing and unique premise that immediately grabs the audience's attention. high ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 )
- The flashback sequences that explore Reginald Hargreeves' past and the origins of the Umbrella Academy provide valuable context and help to establish the unique world and dynamics of the story. high ( Scene 18 Scene 19 Scene 33 )
- The reveal of the hidden basement and the ancient Egyptian statue that Luther activates with the Eye of Anubis gem suggests the presence of deeper mysteries and supernatural elements within the Umbrella Academy's history, which could lead to exciting narrative developments. high ( Scene 47 )
- Lack of diversity The main characters of the Umbrella Academy are predominantly white, with the exception of Allison. The script could benefit from a more diverse representation of racial and ethnic backgrounds among the siblings. medium
- Exposition Dump In a few instances, the script relies on dialogue to provide large amounts of expository information, such as the details surrounding Reginald Hargreeves' death and the Umbrella Academy's history. This could be streamlined and integrated more organically into the story. medium
Engine: Gemini
Recommend
Executive Summary
The "Umbrella Academy" pilot is a strong contender, boasting a unique premise, compelling characters, and a fast-paced, engaging narrative. While some character motivations could be further developed and a few plot threads feel slightly underdeveloped, the overall concept and execution are exceptionally promising. The pilot successfully sets up a compelling overarching mystery and introduces a diverse and intriguing cast of characters, leaving the audience eager for more. Minor improvements to pacing and character depth would elevate the pilot to the next level.
- The action sequences are dynamic and creative, showcasing the unique powers of each sibling in a visually exciting manner. They are both well-choreographed and well-paced. The bank heist flashback sequence, in particular, is a masterclass in action and suspense. high ( Scene 7 Scene 32 )
- The pilot effectively introduces a diverse and memorable cast of characters, each with unique personalities and backstories. Their dysfunctional dynamics and individual struggles are engaging, making the audience invested in their relationships and future arcs. high ( Scene 6 Scene 12 Scene 28 )
- The mystery surrounding their father's death is compelling and effectively sets up the central conflict. The revelation of the impending apocalypse and Number Five's role in it adds significant stakes to the narrative, prompting anticipation for the following episodes. high ( Scene 10 Scene 50 )
- The flashbacks are seamlessly integrated into the present-day narrative, providing crucial backstory while enriching the characters' motivations and relationships. They add depth without slowing down the main plot. medium ( Scene 18 Scene 33 Scene 45 )
- The script builds emotional intimacy and connections between the characters, particularly between Luther and Allison, showing hints of their past and a potential for future reconciliation. The emotional beats are well-placed and impactful, contributing to the overall emotional resonance of the story. medium ( Scene 40 Scene 47 )
- While Number Five's return is intriguing, his immediate actions and motivations could be better established. A more gradual revelation of his experiences in the future would enhance the impact of his character and build suspense. medium ( Scene 24 Scene 25 )
- The pacing in the funeral scene could be tightened. While the sibling conflict is evident, the fight scene could benefit from more focused direction and sharper editing to maintain the intensity. medium ( Scene 29 )
- The final confrontation in the diner, while exciting, feels somewhat rushed. More visual detail and emotional resonance to the violence could enhance the impact. medium ( Scene 42 )
- The opening sequence, while establishing the premise, could benefit from a more captivating visual style. Sharper imagery and a more immediate hook would draw the audience in more quickly. low ( Scene 1 Scene 2 Scene 3 )
- Some character motivations, particularly among the siblings beyond Luther, require further development. Their individual goals and desires beyond their familial relationships could add greater complexity and intrigue. low
- While the pilot effectively introduces the overarching mystery, it could benefit from additional clues or foreshadowing to further intrigue the audience and build suspense. Subtle hints of upcoming plot points would enhance the anticipation for future episodes. medium
- More detailed development of the Temps Aetarnali's motives and goals would increase the sense of threat and anticipation. This would make the threat they pose clearer to the audience. low
- The pilot could benefit from more exposition on the nature of the siblings’ powers and their origins. While showcased in action, their unique abilities could use a little more contextual explanation to deepen the world-building and viewer understanding. low
- The training montage sequence effectively portrays the harsh and unconventional methods used by Sir Reginald Hargreeves to train his children, establishing the trauma that shapes their adult lives. high ( Scene 18 )
- The ending reveals that Diego possesses the missing monocle and seemingly disposes of it, implying he might be involved in their father's death in a subtle yet effective way. This leaves a cliffhanger that promises more in the future. high ( Scene 49 )
- The final scene effectively introduces a looming apocalyptic threat, setting the stage for the series' central conflict and creating a powerful and ominous ending. high ( Scene 50 Scene 51 )
- The unique tone blends dark humor with intense drama, creating a captivating and unpredictable viewing experience. medium
- The visual descriptions are rich and evocative, offering a clear picture of the settings and characters, which is helpful for potential visualization and adaptation. low
- Underdeveloped Villain Motivation The motivations of the Temps Aetarnali are not fully explained. While their actions are clear, understanding their ultimate goals and the reasons behind their actions would strengthen the narrative and establish a more compelling antagonist. medium
- Over-reliance on exposition In several scenes, information is delivered through dialogue rather than being shown through action or visual storytelling. For example, Number Five's explanation of his time-travel method could be more subtly conveyed. low
Engine: GPT4
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
The pilot episode of 'The Umbrella Academy' presents a unique blend of dark humor, family dynamics, and superhero elements, establishing a compelling narrative that hooks the audience from the start. The screenplay effectively introduces a diverse cast of characters, each with distinct motivations and conflicts, while weaving in themes of loss, identity, and the consequences of familial relationships. The pacing is generally strong, though some scenes could benefit from tighter editing. Overall, the pilot sets a solid foundation for an engaging series.
- The screenplay opens with a captivating prologue that sets the tone and introduces the central mystery of the story, effectively engaging the audience's curiosity. high ( Scene 1 (EXT. POLISH VILLAGE - FLASHBACK - DAY) Scene 10 (EXT. STREETS OF NEW YORK - NIGHT) )
- The character development is strong, with each sibling's unique personality and backstory being introduced in a way that hints at their complexities and conflicts. high ( Scene 12 (INT. MANSION - GRAND HALL - MOMENTS LATER) Scene 29 (EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - SUNDOWN) )
- The dialogue is sharp and witty, effectively conveying character dynamics and enhancing the humor amidst the darker themes. medium ( Scene 17 (INT. MANSION - DINING ROOM - SHORT TIME LATER) )
- The screenplay successfully balances action and emotional moments, maintaining a compelling pace that keeps the audience engaged. high ( Scene 23 (EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - GROUNDS - SAME TIME) )
- The ending leaves viewers with a strong cliffhanger, effectively setting up anticipation for future episodes and the unfolding mystery. high ( Scene 50 (INT. VANYA’S APARTMENT - LATE NIGHT) )
- Some scenes, particularly the home invasion, could be streamlined to enhance tension and maintain pacing. medium ( Scene 5 (EXT. SUBURBAN NEIGHBORHOOD - NIGHT) )
- The emotional stakes could be heightened in certain interactions, particularly among siblings, to deepen the audience's investment in their relationships. medium ( Scene 14 (INT. MANSION - LIBRARY - DAY) )
- Some character motivations could be more clearly defined, particularly regarding their feelings towards their father and each other. medium ( Scene 26 (INT. MANSION - HARGREEVES’ OFFICE - AFTERNOON) )
- The pacing in the latter half of the pilot feels slightly rushed, particularly in the buildup to the climax. medium ( Scene 36 (INT. MANSION - NIGHT) )
- The transition between scenes could be smoother to maintain narrative flow and coherence. low ( Scene 48 (INT. CONCERT HALL - NIGHT) )
- A deeper exploration of Vanya's character and her struggles could enhance her arc and connection to the audience. medium ( Scene 4 (EXT. CONCERT HALL - NIGHT) )
- More background on the siblings' childhood and their training could provide context for their current dynamics and abilities. medium ( Scene 19 (INT. MANSION - TRAINING ROOM - CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS) )
- The screenplay could benefit from additional foreshadowing of Vanya's powers and their significance to the plot. medium ( Scene 22 (INT. MANSION - VANYA’S ROOM - SAME TIME) )
- A clearer setup for the overarching antagonist could enhance the stakes and tension moving forward. medium ( Scene 46 (INT. MANSION - HARGREEVES’ OFFICE - NIGHT) )
- More exposition on the world outside the Academy could provide context for the siblings' actions and the societal implications of their powers. low ( Scene 45 (EXT. PRESS CONFERENCE - DAY - FLASHBACK) )
- The opening scenes effectively establish a mysterious and intriguing premise that draws viewers in. high ( Scene 3 (EXT. POLISH VILLAGE - NIGHT) )
- The flashbacks provide a rich backstory that enhances the current narrative and character motivations. high ( Scene 18 (INT. MANSION - TRAINING ROOM - FLASHBACK) )
- The use of humor, particularly through Klaus, adds a unique flavor to the screenplay, balancing darker themes. medium ( Scene 37 (EXT. UMBRELLA ACADEMY - NIGHT) )
- The emotional weight of the siblings' shared trauma is palpable, adding depth to their interactions. high ( Scene 49 (EXT. WATERFRONT - NIGHT) )
- The pilot's conclusion effectively sets up future conflicts and mysteries, leaving the audience eager for more. high ( Scene 51 (EXT. POST-APOCALYPTIC LANDSCAPE - DAY) )
- Character Depth While the characters are introduced with distinct personalities, some lack depth in their motivations and emotional arcs, particularly Vanya and Diego, who could benefit from more backstory and internal conflict. medium
- Pacing Issues Certain scenes feel rushed or overly drawn out, particularly in the latter half of the pilot, which can disrupt the overall flow of the narrative. medium
Memorable lines in the script:
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12 | TEDDY BEAR: MY PURPOSE IS LOVE! |
13 | Luther: There’s no mystery here. There’s nothing to solve, or avenge, or anything else. Dad got old, and he died alone, just like we always knew he would. End of story. |
9 | Vanya: I just bombed the audition. |
29 | Diego: He was a monster. He was bad as a person and worse as a father, and the world’s better off without him. |
17 | Luther: You think one of us did it. |