Leaving Las Vegas
Executive Summary
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Overview
Genres: Drama, Romance, Thriller, Character Study, Crime
Setting: Contemporary, Los Angeles and Las Vegas
Overview: Leaving Las Vegas follows Ben, a disheveled man in his thirties, who arrives in Las Vegas with the intention of drinking himself to death after losing everything. He encounters Sera, a beautiful and complex woman working as a sex worker, who is also grappling with her own demons. Their paths intertwine as they navigate their respective struggles with addiction, loneliness, and the search for connection. As their relationship deepens, both characters confront their vulnerabilities and the harsh realities of their lives, leading to moments of tenderness and despair. The story unfolds against the vibrant yet grim backdrop of Las Vegas, ultimately exploring the themes of love, redemption, and the human condition.
Themes: Addiction and Despair, Loneliness and Isolation, Redemption and Hope, Power Dynamics in Relationships, The Illusion of Glamour
Conflict and Stakes: Ben's struggle with alcoholism and self-destruction, which threatens his relationship with Sera and his own life, while Sera grapples with her abusive relationship with Yuri and her desire for a better life.
Overall Mood: Somber and reflective, with moments of tension and dark humor.
Mood/Tone at Key Scenes:
- Scene 1: Tense and awkward as Ben seeks help from Peter, highlighting his desperation.
Standout Features:
- Unique Hook: The intertwining lives of Ben and Sera, both struggling with their pasts and seeking connection in a harsh environment.
- Major Twist: Sera's transformation from a vulnerable character to one who asserts her agency in the face of adversity.
- Distinctive Setting: The contrasting environments of Los Angeles and Las Vegas, highlighting the allure and dangers of both cities.
- Innovative Ideas: The exploration of addiction and its impact on relationships, presented through a raw and unfiltered lens.
Comparable Scripts:
- Leaving Las Vegas
- Requiem for a Dream
- The Wrestler
- Trainspotting
- The Basketball Diaries
- Pulp Fiction
- A Streetcar Named Desire
- The Virgin Suicides
- Her
Writing Style:
The screenplay exhibits a gritty and intense writing style characterized by sharp dialogue, complex character dynamics, and a focus on moral ambiguity and existential themes. The narrative often delves into the darker aspects of human nature, exploring themes of addiction, power dynamics, and emotional struggles, while maintaining a sense of tension and unpredictability throughout.
Style Similarities:
- Quentin Tarantino
- David Mamet
- Paul Schrader
- Charlie Kaufman
Pass/Consider/Recommend
Recommend
Explanation: Leaving Las Vegas is a poignant character-driven drama that explores the complex and tragic relationship between an alcoholic screenwriter, Ben, and a prostitute, Sera, in Las Vegas. The screenplay is a showcase of exceptional writing, with a consistent tone, well-developed characters, and a compelling narrative that delves into themes of addiction, love, and the human condition. While the story can be emotionally challenging at times, it is a masterfully crafted piece that captivates the audience from start to finish.
USP: The screenplay's unflinching honesty and the deep emotional connection between the protagonists set it apart. It explores themes of addiction, love, and redemption in a way that is both brutal and beautiful, making it compelling for audiences seeking profound, character-driven narratives.
Market Analysis
Budget Estimate:$15-25 million
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 18-45, particularly those interested in drama, romance, and stories about addiction and personal struggle.
Marketability: The screenplay addresses relevant social issues and features complex characters, appealing to audiences looking for depth in storytelling.
While it has strong themes, the heavy subject matter may limit its appeal to mainstream audiences.
The unique blend of romance and drama, along with the gritty realism, could attract niche audiences and festival circuits.
Profit Potential: Moderate to high, as it could perform well in independent film circuits and potentially gain traction through awards recognition.
Analysis Criteria Percentiles
Writer's Voice
Summary:The writer's voice is characterized by sharp, introspective dialogue, vivid imagery, and a focus on the internal struggles of complex characters. The narrative style blends realism with emotional depth, creating a palpable tension that reflects the characters' vulnerabilities and moral ambiguities. This voice manifests through a mix of dark humor and poignant moments, inviting the audience to engage deeply with the characters' journeys.
Best representation: Scene 6 - Facade of Professionalism. This scene is the best representation because it encapsulates the writer's unique voice through its vivid and provocative dialogue, immersive scene direction, and thematic depth. It highlights Ben's internal struggle between fantasy and reality, showcasing the emotional tension and complexity that define the screenplay.
Memorable Lines:
- Sera: I love you. (Scene 40)
- Ben: I really wish that you'd come home with me. You're so cute and I'm really good in bed... believe me... you smell good too... (Scene 15)
- Sera: The only thing I have to come home to is a bottle of Listerine to wash the taste of come out of my mouth. I'm tired of being alone... that's what I'm tired of. (Scene 36)
- YURI: Is this how you would repay me for coming all this way to find you again? Driving through the desert to protect my little Sera. (Scene 4)
- BEN: I wonder if you'll take two hundred and fifty dollars to fuck me? (Scene 25)
Characters
Ben:A disheveled man in his thirties struggling with alcoholism and personal demons.
Sera:A young woman in her late twenties to early thirties, navigating her life as a sex worker while seeking connection.
Yuri:A Russian man who exerts control over Sera, representing a toxic relationship.
Peter:A young executive who represents Ben's past life and the financial struggles he faces.
Story Shape
Screenplay Story Analysis
Note: This is the overall critique. For scene by scene critique click here
Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | |||||||||||||||||
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Click for Full Analysis | Tone | Overall Grade | Concept | Plot | Originality Score | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
1 - Desperate Plea | Tense, Awkward, Melancholic | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
2 - A Mysterious Entrance | Mysterious, Seductive, Intriguing | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
3 - A Gift in the Night | Tense, Seductive, Sinister | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
4 - Reflections of Control | Tense, Seductive, Intense | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
5 - Shifting Shadows | Tense, Dark, Unsettling | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
6 - Escapism in a Glass | Dark, Intense, Seductive | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
7 - Facade of Professionalism | Melancholic, Tender, Cautious | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
8 - Bittersweet Farewell | Tense, Dark, Melancholic | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
9 - A Chance Encounter | Observational, Reflective, Intrigued | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 6 | 2 | 5 | 3 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | |
10 - A Broken Bike and Unspoken Worries | Upset, Concerned, Mechanical, Dejected | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
11 - A Dance with Resignation | Melancholic, Reflective, Introspective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 3 | 5 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | |
12 - Intimacy in Shadows | Intimate, Emotional, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 7 | |
13 - Uneasy Affections | Tense, Intense, Dark | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
14 - Torn Between Control and Care | Tense, Intense, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
15 - Desperate Connections | Pathetic, Disappointment, Sadness, Embarrassment | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
16 - Reflections in the Night | Melancholic, Reflective, Cynical | 7.5 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
17 - Desperate Encounters on Sunset Boulevard | Dark, Intense, Desperate | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
18 - Morning Reflections | Reflective, Introspective, Regretful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
19 - A Struggle to Cash a Check | Embarrassed, Puzzled, Serious | 7.5 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
20 - A Drink and a Dilemma | Emotional, Tense, Melancholic | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
21 - Unrequited Dreams | Introspective, Melancholic, Erotic | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
22 - Clearing the Past | Melancholic, Reflective, Regretful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 4 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 5 | 9 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | |
23 - Embers of the Past | Intense, Reflective, Emotional | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
24 - Desert Encounters and Neon Nights | Intense, Dark, Suspenseful | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
25 - A Transaction on The Strip | Intimate, Tense, Vulnerable | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
26 - Fading Connections | Intimate, Reflective, Vulnerable | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
27 - Unexpected Connections | Intimate, Vulnerable, Sensual, Conflicted | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
28 - Descent in the Neon Lights | Melancholic, Reflective, Intimate | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 4 | 7 | 3 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
29 - Confrontation at Dawn | Tense, Intense, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
30 - Misunderstood Intentions | Uncomfortable, Tense, Misunderstood, Friendly | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
31 - Unresolved Connections | Melancholic, Intimate, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
32 - Paranoia and Separation | Tense, Suspenseful, Mysterious | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
33 - A Step Towards Connection | Melancholic, Intimate, Hopeful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
34 - An Evening Stroll | Intimate, Reflective, Vulnerable | 8.5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
35 - A Night of Connection | Introspective, Emotional, Vulnerable, Hopeful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
36 - A Moment of Vulnerability | Intense, Emotional, Tense, Serious | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
37 - Packing Doubts | Melancholic, Reflective, Introspective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | |
38 - A Cheerful Distraction | Intimate, Vulnerable, Tender | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
39 - Gifts of Connection | Intimate, Vulnerable, Reflective | 8.7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
40 - A Night of Chaos on The Strip | Intimate, Tense, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
41 - Morning After Chaos | Intimate, Reflective, Tender | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
42 - Morning Mayhem at the Bar | Intense, Dark, Violent | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
43 - A Morning of Care and Confusion | Intimate, Playful, Concerned | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
44 - Fractured Moments | Intimate, Emotional, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 5 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
45 - Tension in the Mall | Tense, Intimate, Reflective | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | |
46 - A Night of Transformation | Intimate, Tender, Hopeful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 7 | 4 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
47 - Underwater Connection | Intimate, Vulnerable, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
48 - Reflections by the Pool | Intimate, Reflective, Emotional | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 3 | 6 | 6 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
49 - Poolside Recklessness | Intimate, Playful, Tense | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
50 - Love in the Shadows | Intimate, Reflective, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 4 | 6 | 5 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
51 - Silent Struggles | Tense, Emotional, Defiant | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
52 - High Stakes and Temptation | Intense, Sensual, Emotional | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
53 - Betrayal Unveiled | Emotional, Intimate, Regretful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
54 - Negotiating on The Strip | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
55 - Negotiation Turned Violent | Intense, Dark, Disturbing | 8.5 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | |
56 - Silent Suffering | Tense, Emotional, Confrontational | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
57 - A Fragile Farewell | Sadness, Resignation, Conflict | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
58 - Vulnerability on The Strip | Dejected, Vulnerable, Cold | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
59 - Descent into Desperation | Desperation, Vulnerability, Shock | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
60 - Desperate Connections | Intimate, Emotional, Vulnerable, Regretful | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 |
Scene 1 - Desperate Plea
by
Mike Figgis
Based on the novel by John O'Brian
SHOOTING SCRIPT
September 1994
TITLE ON BLACK; '10 P.M. - LOS ANGELES'
DISSOLVE TO:
1 INT. SMART BAR IN BEVERLY HILLS - NIGHT
It is the kind of bar where the well-to-do folks of LA go
to pick up - or be picked up. Lesser-known actors, agents
and executives of all ages.
Into this bar comes Ben.
Ben is in his thirties. He is wearing an Armani suit
that could use a visit to the dry-cleaner's. He hasn't
shaved in the last twenty-four hours (but neither has
any of the actors in the bar). He is a good-looking man
but is clearly in trouble of some kind. Although still
in control of his faculties, it becomes clear in the
following scene that he is much the worse for wear with
drink. He looks around the room until he sees someone he
recognizes and then walks over to a table where two couples
are seated. The men are young execs, the girls, both blonde
and busty, have very white teeth and smile all of the time.
The camera follows Ben over to the table. One of the execs
looks up as Ben gets close. He recognizes him but delays
his recognition until the last moment in the hope that Ben
is not looking at him.
BEN
Peter
PETER
Ben... how are you, man?
They shake hands. Ben is not invited to take a seat and
Peter waits for a while before being forced to introduce him
to the table.
Ben Sanderson, Marc Nussbaum, Sheila, Debbie.
MARC
Nice to meet you. I think I
spoke to you on the phone a
couple of years ago. Weren't
you both at MGM with Laddie?
BEN
That's right. Are you still
at ICM?
MARC
No, I'm at Tri-Star now.
BEN
That's great. Say hello to
Mike for me. That's a
beautiful dress, Debbie, and
those are fabulous earrings,
Sheila.
There is an awkward silence. Ben does not make a move and
is not invited to join them. The girls smile.
MARC
I gotta tell you, I'm a big
fan of your writing. I loved
Bay of Pigs.
BEN
Thanks a lot. I didn't
actually write it, I just got
the credit. I was fired.
(to Peter)
Can I talk to you for a
moment?
Peter gets up and he and Ben walk to the door together.
Peter speaks very quietly.
PETER
Listen, Ben, I can't help you
any more. Do you understand?
BEN
This is the last time.
Promise. I just need some
cash tonight. I lost my
credit cards. The money'll be
on your desk first thing
tomorrow morning, Scout's
honor. How's the new one
coming along? I here you got
Richard Gere.
The two men look at each other for a while. Peter's
friends are looking at them, as are other people in
the room. Peter takes out his wallet and extracts some
notes.
PETER
This is all I have in cash.
Please don't drink it here.
BEN
Yes, that's fine. I'll
messenger it over to you
tomorrow.
PETER
I don't want it. Ben... I
think it would be best if you
didn't contact me again.
And he turns and walks away, back to his table.
CUT TO BLACK:
TITLE ON BLACK; 'LAS VEGAS - 1.20 A.M.'
FADE UP ON:
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Scene 2 - A Mysterious Entrance
Las Vegas. A blaze of color in the middle of a desert.
Credit sequence begins.
CUT TO:
3 INT. LOBBY OF EXPENSIVE HOTEL - NIGHT
A mixture of businessmen and gamblers creates a sense
of activity and superficial excitement. Music wafts
across the soundtrack, almost drowned by the dense
texture of thousands of slot machines, creating an
insane New Age symphony.
Credit sequence ends.
Into the lobby from the street comes Sera.
It's hard to tell how old Sera is - somewhere between
twenty-five and thirty-five. She is a beautiful American
girl. Her face has the freshness of a model in a Sears
catalogue. She is dressed simply in a short black skirt
and matching jacket. High heels complete the picture.
Heads turn as she passes a group of businessmen and it's
clear they find her very sexy. She acknowledges their
glance with a half-smile and steps into the elevator.
She could be a secretary, or a PA to one of the many
execs here in Las Vegas at a convention. The body language
is a bit different, though.
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Scene 3 - A Gift in the Night
A view of night-time Las Vegas through a window. Traffic up
and down The Strip; bright, gaudy neon flashing and winking.
We hear the sound of men laughing and the camera pulls
focus and we see reflected in the glass...
...a group of people.
On the table are bowls of potato chips and dip and
sandwiches. The TV is on at a sports channel and two
boxers pound the shit out of each other.
CUT TO:
5 INT. ELEVATOR - NIGHT
Sera looks at herself in the gold-tinted mirror in
the elevator. She takes out a lipstick and freshens
her lips. Some people get out and the elevator climbs
higher. We see from the indicator that she has punched
the Penthouse button. Camera moves in tighter and we
see that she is nervous but concealing it well. The
elevator stops, the doors open and she steps right
into the Penthouse.
6 INT. PENTHOUSE - NIGHT
A bottle of Scotch is almost empty. The man talking is Yuri.
He is Russian, in his early forties, a little overweight,
a big man wearing a blue silk suit. His thick black hair
is greased and combed back. He wears a lot of jewelry,
all gold. Rings, a bracelet and a Rolex. Two men in
business suits and a weird stoned woman in her late
thirties listen to him.
YURI
...but please, my friends,
call me Yuri. It is my
American name... I picked it
myself.
The three people laugh. There is a hint of contempt in
the way that they speak to Yuri.
FIRST BUSINESSMAN
Where are you from, Yuri? I
mean, you sure don't talk
like you're from this neck of
the woods.
Yuri smiles at them.
YURI
(silky voice)
No... you are right, my
friend. How very observant
you are. I am from Latvia.
WEIRD WOMAN
Tough place.
YURI
Yes, I hear this too. But I
am not a tough man. I am a
simple man who is here to
learn from my new American
friends.
The door opens and Sera comes in. Everybody stares at her.
WEIRD WOMAN
(turned on)
Is this your friend, Yuri?
YURI
Ah, yes... Sera.
The second businessman takes out a small manila envelope from
his inside pocket.
YURI(cont'd)
Sera is my gift to you, my
friends from New York City.
You may do with her as you
wish in this beautiful room,
which is also my gift for the
night to my friends. You will
find her a very willing girl,
for all of you...just as we
arranged.
Yuri smiles again as the Second Businessman hands him the
envelope. The rest of them just stare at Sera, aroused by the
idea of her.
SECOND BUSINESSMAN
Of course, Yuri. I think
you'll find this just as we
discussed.
Yuri gets up.
YURI
So, my friends... I have other
business to attend. Enjoy.
He heads for the door, passing Sera. She holds out his arm as
he passes.
SERA
(whispering)
Yuri... please! Can I talk to
you for a moment.
Still smiling, he takes Sera's arm and leads her into the
bedroom.
YURI
My friends... excuse me for
just one moment.
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Scene 4 - Reflections of Control
Mirrors reflect mirrors.
SERA
I don't want this. Yuri,
please. I really don't want
this. You know I don't like
to do groups.
YURI
(playful)
I want this, Sera. I need
this!
SERA
Please, Yuri.
He holds put his arms. Sera goes to him. He hugs her with one
arm. He pulls up her skirt so that her panties are exposed.
YURI
(seductive)
These are pretty.
Sera watches in the mirror as he pulls her panties to reveal
her buttocks. He strokes her there gently with his other
hand. We see that there are two fine scars there. He speaks
gently, like a father to a daughter.
YURI(cont'd)
Is this how you would repay
me for coming all this way to
find you again? Driving
through the desert to protect
my little Sera.
CUT TO:
FLASHBACK-SILENT-GRAINY BLACK AND WHITE
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Scene 5 - Shifting Shadows
Yuri and Sera - different time, different place. Sera looking
frightened, backing away from Yuri, who pulls a switchblade
from his jacket and opens it.
CUT BACK TO:
9 INT. PENTHOUSE - NIGHT
Yuri enters from the bedroom. The weird woman is doing a line
of coke.
YURI
(cheerful)
Sera wanted me to ask if she
might undress at once for
you. She has a very beautiful
undergarment witch she would
like you to see.
ANGLE ON BEDROOM DOOR
Sera comes into the room. She smiles and begins unbuttoning
her jacket.
She takes it off and drops it on the floor, and then unzips
her skirt and steps out of it. Sera is now in control and
playing the room. In the background. Yuri leaves the room.
WEIRD WOMAN
(strange voice)
Come here.
Sera walks over and something strange takes place between
them.
CUT TO:
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Scene 6 - Escapism in a Glass
The bar is dark but through a small window we see that it is
a very bright sunny day outside. The bartender reads the Los
Angeles Times. The bar surface is red vinyl. There are five
customers, all single men. One of them is Ben and he is
sitting at the bar watching TV. A game show is in progress
and the TV sound is loud. Ben finishes his drink and grimaces
before indicating to the barman that he'd like a repeat.
Barman pours him a whiskey - Cranberry - and the camera moves
in closer to Ben, ending in a close-up. Ben takes a big hit
from the drink and concentrates on the TV. We hear from the
TV sound that it is a word game with a big prize. Ben smiles
to himself.
BEN'S POV OF TV
The talk show hostess, an American TV beauty, is showing the
audience the prizes available in today's game show.
ANGLE ON BEN
As he finishes that drink and asks for another. The camera
moves in close on his eyes.
BEN'S POV OF TV
She turns from the prizes and looks straight into the TV
camera, which starts zooming into her. At first, what she is
saying makes complete sense, but then things change...
HOSTESS
(smoky, sexy voice)
Just look at this studio,
Ben, filled with glamorous
merchandise, including an
extra special prize chosen
just for You! A big, bad, BMW
motorcycle, complete with
saddle bags stuffed with
thousands of US dollars.
"There are oohs" from the audience.
HOSTESS
So, Ben,
(tosses her hair)
Let's find a bar, get drunk
and go for a ride.
The studio lights dim.
HOSTESS
Then we can get a suite
somewhere and order up a case
of champagne while we fuck
ourselves silly.
Close-up on males in the audience doing the grunt.
HOSTESS
This is it, just for You,
Ben.
She unbuttons her top, licks her fingers and makes her
nipples hard.
HOSTESS
Because You've been so
patient, and because I want
to fuck you, take care of
You, and because there's
nothing else in the world
worth doing.
Section of the audience clapping - some women dabbing their
eyes.
HOSTESS
Tell you what, Ben, let's go
to Las Vegas. The bars stay
open twenty four hours night
and day. Just you, just me,
Ben, think about it, all
right?
ANGLE ON BEN
Lost in his fantasy
BEN
I'll think about it.
He looks back at the screen, but the show has returned to
what is known as "normal". He finishes his drink and then an
attack of nausea hit him. He takes a deep breath and rolls
his neck and his head. The barman puts down a fresh drink.
Ben looks at his own hands...which are steady.
BARMAN
You should go on that show.
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Scene 7 - Facade of Professionalism
Ben sitting at a desk with a phone wedged on his ear, a cup
of black coffee on the desk. The walls are covered with
framed film posters and one complete wall has shelves
jammed
with scripts. He nods from time to time and sometimes says
'yes' or 'OK', but it becomes clear that there is no one on
the other end. He drinks from the coffee cup. A woman comes
up to his desk, a business colleague. She puts a wad of
messages down on the desk.
BEN
Yeah, but what's the back end
like? By the time we're
through with P and A, the
above-the line is going to
take it to about fifteen and
with something like this... I
don't know if Disney will go
for it... can I call you back
on this? OK... chow for now.
(to the woman)
Good morning.
WOMAN
(cautious)
Ben... Mr. Simpson was looking
for you. I said that you had
a doctor's appointment. He
said for you to go in as soon
as... are you OK?
BEN
(pulling himself together)
I'm fantastic, but I gotta go
out now... very important
meeting, could make a coupla
million for the company.
Ben gets up and as he passes her he grabs her and dances a
few steps. It is clear that she likes Ben, but when his face
gets close to hers she smells the alcohol on his breath and
she turns away. Ben stops dancing and smiles sadly.
WOMAN
(tender)
Ben?
BEN
What?
WOMAN
You should go now.
She leaves the room and Ben goes through some routine at the
desk. He opens a drawer of a filing cabinet and puts in his
whole arm, looking for something at the very back. He pulls
out a small vodka bottle and opens it and then pours the
contents into his coffee cup. With cup in hand he leaves
the
room.
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Scene 8 - Bittersweet Farewell
Ben is sitting opposite his boss, Mr. Simpson, who is very
upset. He hands Ben an envelope. Ben opens it and pulls out a
check. He looks at the amount.
BEN
(genuinely moved)
This is to generous Peter.
SIMPSON
(close to tears)
Well... we liked having you
around, Ben, but you know how
it is.
BEN
(ashamed)
Sure thing... and I'm sorry.
Ben takes a swig from his coffee cup.
SIMPSON
(trying to cheer things along)
Well... what are you going to
do now?
BEN
I thought I might move out to
Las Vegas.
Simpson looks puzzled.
BEN
The bars never close.
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13 INT. BEN'S BMW — DAY
Ben drives though Beverly Hills. He pours the content of a
small bottle of vodka into an empty Coke can, puts the empty
bottle under the seat and then drinks from the can.
He slips a tape into the player and we hear "Lonely
Teardrops", by Michael McDonald, one of Ben's favorite songs.
At a traffic light a cop on a bike pulls up next to him and
Ben takes a pull from the Coke can and smiles, mouths the
word "hot". The cop nods back at him, the light changes and
they both pull away.
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Scene 9 - A Chance Encounter
Ben carries a brown paper bag which clinks. Camera follows
him as he walks down the street. He looks at...
BEN'S POV
A girl walking ahead of him in the same direction. She is
walking her dog. She is attractive from behind. We hear Ben's
thoughts.
BEN
(voice-over)
Beautiful, no just the shape
which is nice, but the whole
walk, the feeling, the
movement. This girl is
pleased with herself. Maybe
this is the only art I can
appreciate... I don't know if
this is good or bad, but
right now she is really
beautiful. When I was a boy
it would have been really
important that she have a
pretty face, to go with this
body, I mean. I still would
like to see her face, but her
beauty is no dependent on her
face.
The dog gets interested in something on the sidewalk and she
bends down to pull at its collar.
BEN
(voice-over)
I wonder what kind of panties
she's wearing. Shit, that's
too specific, but... on the
other hand, you can never be
too specific... but then, the
infinitesimal must be, by
definition, as infinite as
the infinite.
Suddenly the girl stops. Ben catches up with her and cannot
resist looking into her face.
BEN
(voice-over)
God, she's so young.
The girl sees Ben and smiles an innocent smile,
GIRL
Hi!
BEN
Hi...
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Scene 10 - A Broken Bike and Unspoken Worries
Ben walks up to his house still carrying the paper bag. A
young boy of about thirteen years of age is fixing a beat-up
bike. Ben greets him.
BEN
Hey, Brad... how's it going?
BRAD
Hey Ben. There were a couple
of guys looking for you.
BEN
What did they look like?
BRAD
Suits. I didn't tell them
anything. You know anything
about gears?
Ben takes a look. The gear mechanism is all bent out of
shape. He bends down to have a look. It is clear from the way
he deals with this mechanical problem that he's good with his
hands. He doesn't try to force anything but he moves the
chain and gear mechanism to get to the problem.
BEN
How'd this happen?
BRAD
I was going real fast down on
the beach and something
slipped and everything got
jammed up.
BEN
The news is not good, kid.
This bit here... see
there... it's broken. You need
a new one.
BRAD
(upset)
How much, do you think?
BEN
I don't know. I'll find out
though.
Ben gets up, picks up his bottles and heads for his house. He
looks back and Brad is sitting still by the bike, looking
totally dejected. This really seems to upset Ben.
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Scene 11 - A Dance with Resignation
Ben is naked and the shower can be heard in the background.
The house is austere, only the minimum of furnishing. He
pours a large tumbler of vodka and takes a gulp, then tops up
the glass. He turns on the stereo, selects a record - Miles
Davis, Kind of Blue - and puts it on the turntable. He turns
on the cassette recorder and inserts a new blank tape. He
puts the machine into the record mode. He kneels down next to
the deck and with complete precision puts the needle on the
second track without any problem. The music starts and
continues through the next sequence.
17 INT. SHOVER - DAY
Ben is in the shower with the glass in his hand.
18 INT. BATHROOM - DAY
Ben shaving with the glass in his hand. He does the area
around his mouth first so that he can drink while he does the
rest.
19 INT. LIVING SPACE - DAY
Showered and shaved and wearing a smart dark suit, Ben looks
handsome and normal. He selects another record and again sets
up the cassette machine to record. He turns the stereo up
full and dances by himself while watching MTV silent. He
tries a turn which is a bit ambitious and loses hi balance.
In slow motion we see him fall. Ben lies still on the floor.
He smiles to himself and decides top stay there for a
while...
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Scene 12 - Intimacy in Shadows
Sera wakes up in bed next to Yuri. (The camera is high above
the bed looking down.) She is completely drenched in sweat. A
thin shaft o light comes from the crack in the drapes and
falls across their bodies. Other than that, the room is
in
darkness. To get out of bed she would have to climb over him.
She lies still. Yuri speaks without opening his eyes...
YURI
I missed you, Sera. You have
been lonely?
Sera blinks and turns her head towards him.
SERA
I'm older now, Yuri.
He puts his hand between her legs, over the sheets and grasps
her there.
YURI
You have been lonely?
SERA
(tensing a little)
I've been all right.
YURI
I will keep you safe. We are
both older.
He climbs on to her and mounts her. Familiarity.
YURI
You have been lonely?
SERA
(flat voice)
I am lonely, Yuri.
He begins thrusting into her.
YURI
Yes... so am I.
Camera move slowly into a tight portrait of Sear.
SERA
(voice-over)
I had a new dress... we were
at the fair, Daddy bought me
an ice-cream and I spilt it
on my dress...
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Scene 13 - Uneasy Affections
Sera is sitting on a sofa talking to an unseen person.
(Although it is no entirely clear when this is taking
place,
the sense of it is that we are in present, i.e. all the
events in the film are in the past tense.)
SERA
... Mom was with Helen, and
Dad looked around first to
see if she was watching and
then he scraped it all off
and threw it on the grass and
then he kissed me and hugged
me and told me it was all
right...
22 INT. SERA'S KITCHEN. LATER THAT DAY
Yuri is tucking into a hearty breakfast. Sera plays with her
food.
YURI
(planning his day)
This is such a small
apartment, Sera. I cannot
stay here. We will find a big
apartment. You know how much
money I can bring you. I
belong in...
(laughs)
... wealth and luxury.
He suddenly looks up from his food and smiles at her.
YURI
Why did you run away from me
in Los Angeles?
Sera says nothing.
YURI
Because you are sly. Mmm? You
knew all along that there was
more money in Las Vegas.
Didn't you?
Sera nervously plays with her food.
YURI
You have nothing to fear from
me. You know why? Because we
belong together, Sera. Don't
we?
Sera forces a smile.
SERA
(quietly)
Yes.
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23 INT. ROOM - NIGHT
Grainy black-and-white image. Sera on a bed, pinned down by
Yuri, who has a knife.
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Scene 14 - Torn Between Control and Care
YURI
I'm pleased with you,
Sera... how you have moved up
in the world. I showed you a
glamorous world when I took
you off the streets...
(shaking his head)
and how you repay me.
SERA
Where have you been staying?
YURI
With an old friend.
He drops his fork.
YURI
But that is none of your
affair. You will call this
morning and book me into a
hotel suite where I will make
new contacts for us.
The mood has changed and Sera does her best to move out of
these dangerous waters.
SERA
You'll need some money, then.
Yuri nods. Sera rises goes to a kitchen drawers and finds
money.
YURI
(becoming angry)
It is, after all, Sera, my
money.
SERA
(calmly)
Yes, of course. How much do
you need?
YURI
(shaking his head)
All of it. I need to buy many
things... all of it!
Yuri is very angry and as Sera hands him the money, he hits
her, hard, knocking her back into the refrigerator. His ring
cuts her cheek.
YURI
(shouting)
Don't look at me like that.
And then his anger goes and he becomes quite tender with her.
He takes her face in his hands to look at the cut.
YURI
It's not so bad. It is
nothing.
(whispers)
I need money, Sera. I need it
fast. You must go on the
street tonight. For me.
He sits down with shaking hands. He suddenly seems more
vulnerable than she is. He goes to the window and looks out,
left and then right, as if he expects to see something.
YURI
I need money fast, Sera. I
want you back on the street.
Tonight.
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Scene 15 - Desperate Connections
Ben opens his eyes. The only light comes from the TV. The
miles Davis record has got caught on a scratch and is
repeating the sane phrase over and over again. He looks at
his gold Rolex and then fingers the wedding band on his
finger.
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26 INT. BEN'S BAR. LA - NIGHT
Ben is sitting at the bar. He drinks a large glass of
something very quickly and then immediately orders another.
He drinks this a little slower but still too quick, finishes
it and then orders another. He looks around the bar and sees
a woman sitting by herself, thirtyish, pretty and receptive.
She looks and sees Ben, and he smiles at her. She smiles
right back. Ben talks across the bar.
BEN
(charming)
Good evening.
PRETTY WOMAN
(pleased)
Hi.
BEN
I'm Benjamin...Ben.
PRETTY WOMAN
I'm Teri.
Ben walks over to where she is. She is pleased that this
good-looking man has come over to make a play. She makes a
noise with her straw to indicate that her glass is empty.
BEN
I'll get you another
one... and me too. Mind if I
join you?
She watches him walk to the bar. He gets the drink and walks
back to her. He sets the drinks down on the table and sits
down. As he does so, his face gets close to hers and she
smells the booze on him.
PRETTY WOMAN
Wow... been drinking all day?
BEN
But of course.
She looks at him, a disappointed expression on her face. She
is no longer interested in being seduced by this man and this
much is clear to Ben.
BEN
Why don't we finish these and
go to my apartment on the
beach?
She doesn't respond.
BEN
We can watch a movie and I'll
mix you up a gooey blender
drink.
Ben winces at his own words. He shakes his head.
PRETTY WOMAN
I have to get up pretty early
tomorrow. I'll just finish
this and go. Thanks anyway.
They drink in silence for a while. Ben takes a deep breath.0
BEN
(pathetic)
I really wish that you'd come
home with me. You're so cute
and I'm really good in
bed... believe me... you smell
good too...
He stops and frowns as he stares into his empty glass.
BEN
No, OK.
Ben tries to stand and has to pull himself up by holding the
bar. It's a strange thing with drunks like Ben... when they're
up they have balance and timing, but when they're down it all
falls apart. She starts to speak but then doesn't. A look of
great sadness comes over her.
PRETTY WOMAN
I have to go now. Thanks
anyway.
She stands to go.
PRETTY WOMAN
Maybe you shouldn't drink so
much.
She walks to the door and Ben turns to the bar, watched by he
Barman, who is a little concerned.
BEN
(to himself)
Maybe I shouldn't breathe so
much, Teri. Ha... ha.
BARMAN
(sever voice)
Time to go, buddy... We're
closing up.
Ben gets out his wallet but his hands are shaking so much
that he cannot extract any bills. He is very embarrassed and
tries again, but to no avail.
BEN
Would you... ?
The barman shakes his head in disgust as he goes into the
wallet and takes some money.
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Scene 16 - Reflections in the Night
Ben is cruising in his car, listening to music on his stereo.
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28 INT. STRIP CLUB - NIGHT
Ben comes into the club and sits down next to the stage,
where a dancer is doing her thing accompanied by a live blue
trio. A swimsuited waitress comes to the table.
WAITRESS
There's a one-drink minimum per show, I hope you saw the sign
when you came in. Anyway, they're supposed to tell you.
BEN
Yes, I heard, and it's not a
problem.
WAITRESS
What do you want?
BEN
What are my choices?
WAITRESS
Everything's ten dollars, and
there's no alcohol.
BEN
No alcohol?
WAITRESS
No alcohol. You gotta get
something else. Everything's
ten dollars. What do you
want?
BEN
What do you think I should
get?
WAITRESS
Non-alcoholic malt beverage?
BEN
... Noooo.
WAITRESS
Orange soda?
BEN
No.
WAITRESS
Coffee?
BEN
No.
WAITRESS
Sparkling apple cider?
BEN
No.
WAITRESS
Water?
BEN
Water?
WAITRESS
One drink minimum per show.
Everything's ten dollars.
Now... tell me what you want
or I'll eighty-six you.
BEN
(decides)
Water.
She writes down W.A.T.E.R. and walks away. Ben calls her
back.
BEN
Just how much would it cost
for you to eighty-six me?
ANGLE ON THE STAGE
A tough black girl dances in a world of her own, impervious
to the men who stare at her. The trio grinds out a dirty
blues. A man opposite Ben places a dollar bill on the stage
and as the dancer squats down to pick it up he stares between
her legs an winks. The Waitress puts down a styrofoam cup and
a bottle of water in front of Ben but refuses to look at him.
WAITRESS
(hostile)
Three-fifty.
Ben puts down a hundred on to her tray.
BEN
(polite)
Could I have fives please?
Keep one for yourself.
This throws the Waitress for a loop.
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29 INT. BATHROOM OF STRIP CLUB - NIGHT
Ben drinks all of a fifth of bourbon. Other guys come and go,
pissing against the urinal. Ben offers one of the guys a
drink, the pianist from the trio. He takes a shot.
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30 INT. STRIP CLUB - NIGHT
Ben sits next to another man watching the show. On stage a
tall blonde dances with her own reflection in a mirror. Ben
turns to his neighbor.
BEN
To me nothing is more
beautiful than the
relationship between the
reflection of a woman and the
woman who has created it.
NEIGHBOR
(completely uninterested)
No shit!
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Scene 17 - Desperate Encounters on Sunset Boulevard
Ben drives in his car.
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31 EXT. SUNSET BOULEVARD - LATER THAT NIGHT
Ben is cruising in his car, listening to 'Lonely Teardrops'
again. He's looking for a prostitute. He sees a girl, but
when he slows down she ducks into a doorway.
He looks in his rear-view mirror and sees a cop car coming up
fast. Ben panics for a second. There is a bottle between his
legs. The cop car draws level and cruises alongside him for a
while, but then puts its lights and siren on and speeds off,
doing a U-turn.
Ben continues and then sees an Hispanic girl and stops. He
winds down the window. He is by now almost incoherent.
BEN
Good evening.
32 EXT. KERBSIDE - NIGHT
The girl looks up and down the street and then walks over to
the car and bends down to the window.
HISPANIC GIRL
You wanna date? You wanna
date me?
The girl's eyes shift constantly from Ben to the street and
then back again.
BEN
(cut to the chase)
I'll give you a hundred
dollars for a straight forty-
five minutes. You get the
room.
Ben shows her the money.
HISPANIC GIRL
(trying to take him)
The room is twenty. You pay
for it.
Ben laughs.
BEN
OK... but only because I think
that the concept of surrender
fits in with the big picture
right now. How about over
there?
He gives her a twenty and indicates a motel across the
street. She sets off and he gets out of the car. As he does,
a wave of nausea hits him. He shakes his head violently and
then lurches across the street, causing two cars to hit their
brakes. The camera follows him into the dark parking lot of
the motel, where the Hispanic girl is waiting.
BEN
(slurring badly)
I canremember... if
mywifeleffme... or Illeff
her... bufuckittanyway...
The girl laughs at Ben and says something in Spanish.
Slowly the picture gets darker, until all that can be seen is
the headlights from the passing cars on Sunset... and then...
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Scene 18 - Morning Reflections
Ben wakes up on the kitchen floor. The fridge door is open
and its light is what lights Ben. Inside the fridge are one
green pepper and four bottles of vodka. Without too much
effort Ben feels for his wallet and sees that it is still
there, as are his car keys. He closes the fridge door and in
the green light from the window he lies still. The first
birds start singing. (the birdsong continues through the
following sequence, which does not have sync sound.)
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34 EXT. SUNSET BOULEVARD MOTEL. PARKING-LOT DUMPSTERS - NIGHT
At the rear of the motel. Next to some garbage hoppers, the
Hispanic girl hugging him and kissing his neck. He tries to
kiss her on the mouth, but she turns her face away.
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35 INT. BEN'S HOUSE - DAWN
Ben lying on the floor, thinking.
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36 EXT. SUNSET BOULEVARD MOTEL. PARKING-LOT DUMPSTERS - NIGHT
The Hispanic girl kneeling in front of him, unzipping his
trousers. Through a gap in the fence, we see traffic going up
and down Sunset.
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37 INT. BEN'S HOUSE - DAWN
Ben lying on the floor, thinking...
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38 EXT. SUNSET BOULEVARD MOTEL. PARKING-LOT DUMPSTERS - NIGHT
The girl takes his hand and kisses it. She begins sucking the
fingers, taking the whole hand into her mouth.
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39 INT. BEN'S HOUSE - DAWN
Ben suddenly sits up and looks at his hand. His wedding ring
has gone. He thinks about this for a long time.
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Scene 19 - A Struggle to Cash a Check
Ben waiting in line to cash a check. He looks unwell and is
having difficulty standing straight. At last it is his turn.
He goes to the counter and hands over a check to the girl.
BANK GIRL
OK... four thousand, six
hundred dollars... one moment,
sir...
She looks at her computer read-out.
BANK GIRL
That'll leave five dollars in
your account. Would you sign
the back of the check,
please?
BEN
(surprised)
You couldn't cash it just
like it is?
BANK GIRL
(puzzled)
I'm sorry, sir. Is there a
problem?
Ben picks up a pen and tries to sign, but his hands are
shaking so much that he cannot do it.
BEN
(embarrassed)
Well... to tell you the truth,
I'm a little shaky right now.
I just had a brain
surgery... Why don't I come
back after lunch, when I'm
feeling a little better? We
can take care of it then.
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Scene 20 - A Drink and a Dilemma
Ben seated at the bar, a pile of bills in front of him. The
Barman sets down a vodka, picks up the empty glass and takes
some bills, shaking his head in disapproval. The TV is on,
some game show as before, and Ben watches carefully, looking
for a sign from the girl, but the show proceeds in its
'normal' fashion. The only difference is that the hostess is
played by the girl in the bank. Ben grabs the Barman's
attention.
BEN
I think, when I'm done with
this, I'll have gin and
tonic... Bombay gin and tonic.
The Barman loses it
BARMAN
(angry)
You should be having coffee.
Do you know what time it is?
You're a young man.
(calmer)
It's none of my business, but
if you could see what I see,
you wouldn't do this to
yourself.
Ben is taken aback by the emotion in his voice. In his mind,
cynicism and the desire to cry fight it out. He holds the
emotion back, and looks down at the bar.
BEN
I understand what you're
saying... I appreciate your
concern. Its not my intention
to make you uncomfortable.
Please... serve me today and I
will never come in here
again.
(cheerful)
If I do, you can eighty-six
me.
BARMAN
Sure, sure, I can eighty-six
you now if I want to. Stop
fucking with me. I don't give
a fuck what you do.
He picks up a bottle of gin, fills a glass, slams it on the
counter in front of Ben and knocks twice with his knuckles on
the bar.
BARMAN
On the house, son.
Ben looks at the TV for a sign. None is forthcoming.
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Scene 21 - Unrequited Dreams
Ben waiting in line again. The same Bank girl is there and
she is dealing with her customers in the same inanely
cheerful way that the game-show Hostess dealt with her prize-
winners. She notices Ben waiting and an irritated look
flashes over across her face. Ben studies her. She is pretty
in an ordinary kind of way. We hear Ben's thoughts as voice-
over (or maybe he says them out loud to himself).
BEN
(voice over)
Are you desirable? Are you
irresistible? Maybe if you
drank bourbon with me, it
would help. Maybe if you
kissed me and I could taste
the sting in your mouth, it
would help.
Close-up on the Bank Girl as she does her thing, efficiently
counting money, smiling, perfect teeth framed by a Cupid
mouth. She is wearing a white blouse through which frilly
lingerie can just be made out.
BEN
If you drank bourbon with me
naked... if you smelled of
bourbon as you fucked me, it
would help... it would
increase my esteem for you.
If you poured bourbon on to
your naked body and said to
me... drink this...
Camera moves in tighter on her face as she chats with a
customer about the weather.
BEN
... if you spread your legs
and had bourbon dripping from
your breasts and you vagina
and said drink here... then I
could fall in love with you,
because then I would have a
purpose, to clean you up, and
that would prove that I'm
worth something. Id lick you
clean so you could go away
and fuck someone else.
BANK GIRL
Next!
Ben takes a moment to come out of his reverie. He smiles and
comes to the counter, completely in control of himself.
BEN
I'm back, I've got my
check... and baby... I'm ready
to sign.
He flips the check over, makes sure she is watching and signs
with a flourish.
BEN
There... Steady as a fucking
rock, excuse my French.
(serious)
Wanna have dinner with me?
She counts the money out and glares at him as she hands it
over.
BANK GIRL
I'm glad you're feeling
better. Do you need a
validation?
Ben looks at her and smiles.
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Scene 22 - Clearing the Past
Ben throws items into a trolley. Garbage bags, firelighters
and charcoal lighter fluid.
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44 INT. BEN'S KITCHEN - DAY
Ben putting all the kitchen utensils into a large garbage
bag. Three other bags are already filled and the kitchen is
looking empty.
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45 INT. BEN'S BEDROOM - DAY
Ben is stuffing all the bedding into a garbage bag. Next he
opens a drawer on the dresser and begins taking out clothes
and stuffing them into another bag. He pauses for a moment to
take a drink from a tall glass.
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46 INT. BEN'S LIVING ROOM - DAY
All the books from the bookcase go into another bag. Then all
the records. But he selects certain favorites and as this
sequence progresses we can see that Ben is making tapes of
these tracks. As soon as he is done with the recording, he
throws the album into a garbage bag.
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Scene 23 - Embers of the Past
Ben pours lighter fluid on to a pile of photographs and then
throws a match on to it. It bursts into flames. He throws
more stuff on and the fire blazes. A curious neighbor watches
from a safe distance, not wanting too get involved.
ANGLE ON THE FIRE
A watercolor, a poem to his wife, photograph of him and his
wife, a Polaroid of a naked woman, his medical records, his
birth and marriage certificates, divorce papers, strips of
photographs from booths, postcards from Hawaii. Two small
children (his?).
ANGLE ON BEN
Now the flames are high and Ben has to stand back as he
throws things on to the fire ... his camera, an engraved box,
his wife's 'left behind' clothing , a clock...
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48 EXT. BEN'S HOUSE - DAWN
Fifteen neatly tied garbage bags and Ben's furniture are
stacked up on the sidewalk. Ben comes out of his front door
carrying a racing bike. He walks to the neighbors' house and
places the bike on the porch. We see a label saying 'To Brad
from Ben'. He walks to his black car with a small suitcase,
gets in and drives off.
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49 EXT. DESERT LANDSCAPE WITH ROAD - DAY
A high wide shot shows a small black car making its way
across the frame.
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Scene 24 - Desert Encounters and Neon Nights
Through the window we see a dead straight road stretching to
infinity.
The sunlight is painfully bright. On the soundtrack we hear
one of Ben's chosen tapes, which continues through into the
next shot.
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51 EXT. GAS STATION IN THE DESERT - DAY
Ben is filling his car. A Town Car drives in and stops next to
the BMW. Three men get out. They look like Russian Mobsters.
Ben nods at them and they nod back.
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52 INT. CAR - NIGHT
Same angle through the window but this time we see Las Vegas
at night as Ben drives down the main drag. An overdose of
neon.
52A EXT. LAS VEGAS STRIP - NIGHT
Ahead we see the light changing, but Ben doesn't notice until
it's almost to late. The car stops and we see Sera crossing
in front of the car. She gives Ben a look of real attitude
because he is over the line and she has to change course to
cross in front.
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53 EXT. HOTEL FORECOURT - NIGHT
Sera is talking to Yuri. A middle-aged man gets out of a cab
and Yuri shakes him by the hand and introduces him to Sera.
He hands Yuri an envelope and then Sera and he go into the
hotel together. Yuri looks around thoughtfully before getting
into a cab and driving off.
54 INT. DOCTOR'S OFFICE - DAY
Improvised scene.(1)
INT. MOTEL RECEPTION - NIGHT
Ben waits to check in while the manager explains the house
rules to a family of large people from the Midwest.
MANAGER
All rooms to be paid a week
in advance, maid service is
optional, use of the pool is
at your own risk, there is no
lifeguard on duty.
Above the manager's head is the name of the motel, The Whole
Year Inn. Ben stares at it and then smiles.
BEN'S POV
The sign has changed to The Hole You're In.
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Scene 25 - A Transaction on The Strip
Ben has almost filled a trolley with bottles of various
brands. He is whistling and seems happy.
57 INT. DOCTOR'S OFFICE - DAY
Improvised scene.(2)
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58 EXT. THE STRIP - NIGHT
Ben driving. He sees Sera and follows her, then drives up on
the sidewalk. She sees him.
BEN
Hello!
SERA
Hello.
BEN
Are you working?
SERA
(tough)
Working? What do you mean,
working? I'm walking.
And she walks a few steps to prove it, stopping on the
passenger side of his car. They pause for a moment and Ben is
confused. He is quite taken with her beauty, but this is not
going according to plan. He reaches into the car quickly and
picks an open can of bee, draining it before tossing the
empty back on to the rear seat.
SERA
Isn't it illegal to drink and
drive?
BEN
(laughs)
That's funny.
(seriously)
I wonder if you'll take two
hundred and fifty dollars to
fuck me?
Sera doesn't say anything.
BEN
That is, if you'll come to my
room for an hour, I will give
you five hundred dollars.
SERA
Maybe you shouldn't stand in
the road like that. You're
pretty drunk.
He bites his lips as he waits for her to respond.
SERA
(softer)
You're pretty drunk.
BEN
(factual)
Not really. My room's not
far. The Whole Year Inn. You
can drive with me if you
want...
She makes no response.
BEN
... or we can walk... or I'll
give you cab fare.
Takes out his money.
BEN
Whatever you want.
She touches the door handle.
SERA
Why don't you give me the
money when I'm in the car,
and I'll drive you.
It takes a moment or two to register that she is saying yes.
He comes around the car to open the door for her.
BEN
I'm Ben.
They shake hands.
SERA
I'm Sera.
She gets in. Ben gets in.
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Scene 26 - Fading Connections
Ben hands her the money.
BEN
Sarah - with an H?
SERA
No - S.E.R.A.
They grin at each other.
SERA
You wanna start the engine?
They drive off.
60 EXT. MOTEL PARKING LOT - NIGHT
They sit in the car for a while before speaking.
SERA
I'm sort of curious... if
you're willing to pay me two-
fifty... not that I mind... I
mean, I'm OK with that - why
aren't you staying in a
hotel?
BEN
We can go to one if you'd
prefer.
SERA
No, this is fine. I was just
wondering.
Ben switches off the engine but makes no move to get out of
the car.
BEN
Well... I'm here because I'm a
drunk who tends to pass out
at odd hours for
unpredictable stretches. I'm
going to a hotel soon. A room
with a balcony to pass out
on... or off.
He falls silent.
SERA
Umm. We can stay in the car
for an hour if you want. But
I really have to go then.
It's your time.
BEN
Right, I'll get your door. I
tend to fade in and out
lately.
SERA
I guess I do too.
BEN
You what?
SERA
I sometimes fade out.
BEN
Oh... well, maybe we better
synchronize our spells... or
stagger them.
SERA
(gently)
You were going to get my
door.
He gets out and she waits for him to open the door. She gets
out and he offers her his arm. She takes it and they walk
into the motel.
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Scene 27 - Unexpected Connections
As Ben closes the door. Sera surveys the room.
SERA
(amused)
What this room needs... is
more booze.
SERA'S POV
There are bottles everywhere. Ben has gone to a lot of troble
to lay them out in a pleasing way.
BEN
Do you think so?
She turns and looks at him, appraising him. Suddenly
she's
all business, in control, and Ben likes it.
SERA
Mind if I use the bathroom?
BEN
Of course.
She goes into the bathroom.
BEN
Want a drink? I'm having one.
SERA (off-screen)
A shot of tequila, if you can
spare it.
BEN
Of course.
Ben smiles, happier than we've ever seen him. He gets her
order ready and then he takes a big swig from a bourbon
bottle. He sits on the edge of the bed.
The bathroom door opens and Sera comes in wearing a black bra
and panties. She's acting the hooker now, tough and sexy.
SERA
For two-fifty we can do
pretty much what you want.
You've been drinking, so it
might be better if I got on
top, but the other way's fine
too. I have some jelly in
case you want to fuck my ass,
that's up to you. If you want
to come in my face, that's OK
too, just try to keep it out
of my hair, I just washed
it... and my eyes, it stings.
She walks to the table and downs her tequila in one. Then
comes to the bed, where Ben is sitting. She kneels, unzips
his fly and begins sucking him. Ben watches her, looks at her
reflection in the closet mirror, reaches for the bottle and
drinks some, being careful not to disturb Sera. After a while
Sera comes up.
SERA
Do you want to fuck now?
BEN
(confused)
Maybe another drink first.
More tequila?
SERA
OK... whatever.
She takes the bottle and drinks. She goes down again. Ben
stops her.
SERA
What's the story? Are you too
drunk to come?
BEN
(sincere)
I don't care about that.
There's time left. You can
have more money. You can
drink all you want. You can
talk or listen. Just stay,
that's all I want.
She looks at him, confused. She sees a strange look on his
face. It throws her.
This is a turning point. Both of them are momentarily
exposed.
Ben lifts the sheet and moves to one side, indicating that
she should come into the bed. She's as confused as he is. She
gets in with him and he hands her the bottle.
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Scene 28 - Descent in the Neon Lights
Yuri is losing at one of the tables. He continues to bet
though, putting half of what he has left on one number. He
lose again. He mops his face with a red silk handkerchief and
places another bet.
63 INT. SOMEWHERE IN THE CASINO - NIGHT
The three Russian Mobsters we saw in the desert are walking
through the casino, looking for someone.
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64 INT. BEN'S ROOM - NIGHT
They are both in bed, drinking.
SERA
So, Ben, what brings you to
Las Vegas? Business
convention?
They both laugh and Ben hands her the bottle.
BEN
No, I came here to
drink... myself... you know...
SERA
To death?
BEN
Yes, that's right.
He looks at her, she at him, not sure whether to believe him
or not.
BEN
I cashed in all of my money,
paid my AmEx card, gonna sell
the car tomorrow.
SERA
How long's it gonna take, for
you to drink yourself to
death?
BEN
I think about four weeks, and
I've got enough for about two
hundred and fifty to three
hundred dollars a day.
SERA
Yes... that should do it. What
am I? A luxury?
BEN
Yeah. And your meter just ran
out.
Ben looks at his watch.
SERA
It's OK... nice watch. Go on.
Talk some more.
Ben yawns, suddenly deeply tired.
BEN
In LA I kept running out of
booze and the store would be
closed because I'd forget to
look at my watch... so I
decided to move here because
nothing ever closes and
because I got tired of
getting funny looks when I
would walk into a bar at six
o'clock... even the bartenders
started preaching.
(yawns again)
Here, everyone's from out of
town so no one cares, no one
is overtly fucking up
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SIDE ANGLE
Sera is in focus, Ben is asleep.
SERA (voice-over)
I guess I was intrigued by
him... There was a lot of
stuff that I wanted to ask
him about but didn't because
I didn't want to sound too
interested in a trick. But I
felt as if a relationship was
being forged very quickly.
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Scene 29 - Confrontation at Dawn
Improvised scene. (3)
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65A EXT. SERA'S APARTMENT COMPLEX - DAWN
Sera gets out of a cab and makes her way towards her
apartment, changing out of her high heels as she walks.
66 INT. SERA'S HOUSE - DAWN
Sera lets herself in. Yuri is standing in the shadows. She
gets a fright when she sees him.
YURI
Where have you been?
SERA
It was a slow night. I went
to a hotel for a few drinks.
Yuri holds out his hand for her bag. She gives it to him. He
finds the money and counts it.
YURI
A full night on the street
and this is all?
SERA
Like I said... it was a slow
night... I'm sorry. It was
hard to score.
Yuri slaps her.
SERA
Don't hit me.
YURI
What do you think... you are
sixteen years old on
Hollywood Boulevard?
Yuri talks in Russian, becoming angrier, and slaps her again.
He spits on the floor.
Sera falls against the kitchen table and picks up a lethal-
looking knife. Yuri stops.
SERA
Maybe nobody wants to fuck a
chick with a cut on her
cheek.
She throws the knife to Yuri, who catches it. She bends over
the table and pulls up her skirt.
SERA
There, go ahead!
She mimics him.
A shower of Russian comes out of Yuri, but he doesn't touch
her. He tries to regain his dignity by putting on a coat.
YURI
I could kill you. You know
that.
He goes to the door.
YURI
Work, tonight, bring me
money, no matter the hour.
And he exits. Sera is still on the table.
SERA
I will Yuri. I will.
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67 INT. PAWN SHOP - DAY
The proprietor is handling over some cash to Yuri, whose
jewelry is on the counter. He pockets it and as he turns to
leave, Ben comes in. They pass without taking much notice of
each other. Ben removes his Rolex and shows it to the man.
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68 EXT. STREET, LAS VEGAS - DAY
Yuri is walking in the hot sun, sweating. We see him through
long-lens heat haze. The camera wanders into the traffic and
we see the black Town Car crawling along behind him, three men
inside.
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69 INT. DOCTOR'S OFFICE - DAY
Improvised scene. (4)
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Scene 30 - Misunderstood Intentions
A lounge singer belts out a fair rendition of a Tony Orlando
number. Sera sits at the bar, an empty seat on either side of
her. She watches a younger hooker in the final moments of
pulling a dangerous-looking man. The girl is aware of Sera
without even looking at her. The guy she is with looks around
and sees Sera. The girl shoots an icy look. A man sits next
to Sera: a conventioneer.
CONVENTIONEER
About ready for another
drink?
SERA
Yes, that would be great. Are
you her for the convention?
CONVENTIONEER
Do I look that obvious? My
name's Paul.
They shake hands.
SERA
No, of course not, just a
wild guess. I'm Sera and
that's a margarita.
The barman is already pouring. The young hooker leaves
with
her dangerous guy. She pauses long enough to give Sera a
nasty smile. The conventioneer pays for the drink and is a
little lost for words. Sera tries to help.
SERA
So... are you alone, or are
you just using me to make
someone else jealous?
CONVENTIONEER
(laughs nervously)
Alone. Alone. I'm here alone.
SERA
(friendly)
Where are you staying?
CONVENTIONEER
(suspicious)
Right here at the hotel. Why?
SERA
(moving a little closer)
Well... I thought you might be
looking for a date.
CONVENTIONEER
(shocked)
A date. What, are you a
hooker?
(voice getting louder)
What do you mean a date?
(and louder)
I've got a wife back home. I
just came over to talk for a
few minutes.
SERA
(quietly)
I'm sorry, I guess I
misunderstood.
She looks around.
SERA
Please don't raise your
voice. I won't bother you
about it again.
CONVENTIONEER
(calmer)
Sorry. Look... you seem like a
nice girl. I'm just sick of
everyone in this town trying
to get my money.
He gets up.
CONVENTIONEER
Here, have another drink. I
gotta go.
He leaves. Sera is uncomfortable. People are watching her,
aware that something has been going on. The Barman comes over
to where Sera is sitting.
BARMAN
Maybe you should give it a
miss for this evening.
He walks away. Sera finishes her drink and leaves.
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Scene 31 - Unresolved Connections
Sera at work is looking more carefully than usual, hoping to
see Ben. A huge silver limo pulls up and, after some
negotiation, she gets in.
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72 EXT. THE STRIP - NIGHT
Long-lens shot of Ben, very drunk on the street. He falls and
lies still for quite a long time before getting up. He falls
into the road and tries to hail a cab, but none stops. A cop
car cruises to a halt and Ben more or less imitates a normal
person as he walks out of shot.
73 EXT. THE POOL, MOTEL - DAY
Ben dives in and swims a length under water. He pulls himself
out and sits next to the large Midwestern family. The father
says hello and introduces his family to Ben. They are all
very friendly. It's a nice atmosphere around this pool and
for a moment Ben even looks healthy.
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74 EXT. THE STRIP - NIGHT
A limo pulls up and Sera gets out. She sees something.
SERA'S POV
Ben sitting at a bus stop, drinking out of a cocktail glass.
When he sees her he gets up, a little unsteadily.
BEN
I couldn't remember what
happened last time. I was
afraid that I might have been
rude, or mean to you.
He looks at her.
BEN
If I was I'm sorry.
SERA
No, just drunk... but that's
OK. Where's your car?
BEN
I sold it this morning. I'm
going to take cabs from now
on in.
Sera looks up and down the strip.
BEN
Don't run away.
SERA
(defensive)
Why should I? I know you're
not a cop, so what is it
tonight? Another two-fifty to
watch you sleep?
Ben sits down, a little hurt.
SERA
What's up?
BEN
I was looking for you
tonight. I don't know if you
have a boyfriend...
He thinks.
BEN
... or a girlfriend, but if
you have some free
time... maybe we could have
dinner.
SERA
(tough again, but pleased)
Are you serious.
BEN
(deadly serious)
I think you know I'm serious.
I'll pay you if you
like... but I'd like to see
you.
SERA
No, I can't have dinner with
you.
And she hails a taxi, which stops immediately and she gets
in.
SERA
The Mojave Hotel, please.
Ben watches the cab drive off.
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75 INT. CORRIDOR OF HOTEL - NIGHT
Sera walks along, checking numbers on the doors. She finds
the right one and knocks firmly.
YURI (v.o)
Yes? What?
SERA
It's me, Yuri.
The door opens a crack and Yuri peers out.
YURI
Sera! It's...
He looks around for a clock.
YURI
... it's late.
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Scene 32 - Paranoia and Separation
Sera comes into the room, takes her purse out and counts out
seven hundred dollars.
SERA
Sorry, Yuri... good
night... lots of tricks... I
think things are picking up.
Yuri sits on the bed. He looks unwell and disoriented. His
face is covered with a thin film of sweat. He seems to be
listening for something, because he stops her talking by
putting his fingers to his lips. He looks at her and then
beckons her to the bed. Sera is nervous. As she walks to
the
bed, she begins unbuttoning her blouse. Yuri stops her with a
wave of his hand. Sera is puzzled and frightened now. Yuri
seems to be deranged.
YURI
Have you told anyone that I'm
here?
SERA
No.
Yuri suddenly hears something. He grabs Sera's hand and takes
her to the wall. He presses her head to the wall.
YURI
Do you here that?
He looks at her.
YURI
They're talking about me.
He pulls himself together.
YURI
Go, Sera.
(whispers)
Go. Stay at home. I will call
you tomorrow.
SERA
Yuri... are you...
YURI
(patiently)
Sera... please go.
He indicates the wall.
YURI
This is very important... and
I must listen. Now go.
They face each other for a moment and then Yuri does an
almost comic gesture to tell her to go. He hustles her to the
door and shoves her out as she is still buttoning up her
blouse. He slams the door.
YURI
(through the door)
Goodbye, Sera. Don't come
back here. I will not see you
again.
Sera stands there for a while, almost in shock, and then she
begins to walk. The camera follows her as she makes her
way
down the endless corridor of doors. Ahead of her, three men
are walking towards her, checking the door numbers as they
make their way. Sera doesn't take them in. They pass and turn
a corner. We recognize them as the men from the black
Town Car.
ANGLE
The men have stopped outside Yuri's room. The camera pans and
we see Sera down the other corridor getting into the
elevator.
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Scene 33 - A Step Towards Connection
Ben is lying on the bed watching a game show, drinking.
A coughing fit hits him. He is very short of breath. We see
how ill he really is.
There is a tap at the door.
BEN
No thanks... I'm fine.
The tapping persists and eventually Ben gets off the bed and
unlocks it, but keeps the chain on. It is Sera.
SERA
Still want to have dinner?
Ben stares at her for a while.
BEN
Yes.
SERA
I have to change and take a
shower first. If you want to
come home and wait.
Ben opens the door.
SERA
We should pick up a bottle of
tequila on the way. I owe you
one.
BEN
You do?
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Scene 34 - An Evening Stroll
Sera is finishing in the shower and Ben is sitting at the
kitchen table. He gets up and walks around the house, trying
to get a sense of her. The furniture is very plain and there
is spartan quality about the hose. He looks with interest at
the bookshelf, which has a good selection of literature.
BEN
(to himself)
This is the home of an angel.
SERA (off-screen)
You OK out there?
BEN
Yes. Take your time. I'm
fine.
He pours himself another drink.
SERA (off-screen)
Pour yourself another drink.
He sots down and she comes in, toweling her hair.
SERA
You OK?
BEN
Of course. Wow... you look
extremely beautiful.
SERA
Thank you. What time is it?
BEN
Don't know. My watch went the
way of the car.
He holds up his empty wrist for her to see. Then looks up and
sees her watching him.
BEN
I'm rambling. I really like
you. You make me want to
talk... I don't know what time
it is.
SERA
I like hearing you talk.
(businesslike)
If you feel up to a short
walk, there's a place to eat
around the corner. All the
food in Vegas is terrible so
the place doesn't really
matter. How does that sound
to you?
BEN
Do they have drinks?
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79 EXT. THE STRIP - NIGHT
Ben and Sera walk and talk.
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Scene 35 - A Night of Connection
Ben and Sera are eating. He plays with his food, eating very
little of it. Finally he pushes it away and orders another
drink.
SERA
I'm from the East. I went to
college, did an arts course.
I now live in Vegas. I think
of it as home. I came here
deliberately to carve out a
life. I was in LA before, but
I'll come back to that later.
(pause)
The tough times are behind me
now. I can deal with the bad
things that happen. There
will always be dark
characters. But my life is
good. It is as I would want
it to be. So, why are you a
drunk?
BEN
Is that really what you want
to ask me?
SERA
Yes.
BEN
(worried)
Well, then I guess this is
our first date... or our last.
Until now, I wasn't sure it
was either.
SERA
Very clever.
Sera thinks for a while and decides to give in to him on
this.
SERA
First. It's our first. I'm
just concerned. So... why are
you killing yourself?
BEN
Interesting choice of words.
I don't remember. I just know
that I want to.
SERA
Want to kill yourself? Are
you saying that you're
drinking as a way to kill
yourself?
And she leans across the table to be close to him, listening
intently. Ben becomes uncomfortable and tries to joke it off.
BEN
Or killing myself as a way to
drink.
Sera continues to stare at him, wanting to know the real
answer. He takes a slug from his drink. She sits back.
BEN
We'll talk about it some
other time maybe. OK?
Sera relaxes and continues with her food. We hear her
thoughts for a moment.
SERA (v.o)
It wasn't so important to me.
I mean, he never asked me why
I was a hooker, sand that was
impressive. I really liked
him. So I decided to just
play my part. I mean... it's
good to help someone once in
a while., it's a bonus to
being alive, and that was my
plan... to stay alive. I
suddenly came to a decision.
BEN
What are you thinking? Are
you angry with me?
SERA
(decides something)
Ben, why don't you stay at my
place tonight? I mean... look,
you're so drunk. I like you.
I trust you.
BEN
That's astonishing. Sera,
look...
SERA
I hate to think of you in
that cheesy motel. I mean...
And she folds her arms and grins at him.
SERA
Let's face it, what the fuck
are you doing in Las Vegas?
BEN
(overwhelmed by her)
I'm going to move to a smart
hotel, tomorrow if it'll make
you feel better.
(looks at her)
Let's talk about tomorrow.
Wanna do something?
SERA
(warmly)
Sure... tonight. Then please
stay at my place.
BEN
Sera... you know I'm not much
good in the sack.
SERA
It's not about sex, Ben. I'll
make you up a bed on the
sofa. Do it for me. We can
talk till late and then sleep
till late. As you know, I am
my own boss.
Ben laughs loud, the most animated we've seen him, and his
laugh as infectious, and Sera join in. Other diners turn to
stare at them. They seem like a couple.
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Scene 36 - A Moment of Vulnerability
Ben and Sera walk and talk, holding hands.
82 EXT. DESERT - DAY
A wide shot. The black Town Car makes its way across frame.
Left to right.
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83 INT. SERA'S house - day
Ben is asleep on the sofa. As he wakes up, he becomes aware
that Sera is watching him from across the room. They smile at
each other.
BEN
How long have I been her?
SERA
Three nights, two days. When
is your rent coming up at the
motel?
BEN
I don't know.
(sits up)
I'll go and sort it out
today. Why don't you
come?... We'll find a real
room for me. You can pick it
out, a tower on the strip.
SERA
There's no reason to blow all
your money on a hotel room.
BEN
What do you mean?
SERA
What I mean is that you
should bring your stuff over
here. We're spending all this
time together... what the
fuck!
BEN
Sera...
SERA
Let's face it, Ben, we're
having fun here. I've never
done so much talking in my
life.
BEN
Me neither.
SERA
So! Let's dispense with the
formalities. I want you
here... now!
BEN
Sera you are crazy.
SERA
So... I'm not too concerned
with long term plans.
BEN
Don't you think you'll get a
little bored living with a
drunk?
SERA
That is what I want. Why
don't you go and get your
stuff?
BEN
You haven't seen the worst of
it. These last few days I've
been very controlled. I knock
things over... I throw up all
the time.
(looks at her)
Now I feel really
good... You're like some kind
of antidote that mixes the
liquor and keeps me in
balance, but that won't last
forever. You'll get tired of
it really quickly. Believe
me.
They sit in silence for a while.
SERA
OK, you go back to your hotel
and I'll go back to my
glamorous life of being
alone.
She walks out of the room, and into the bathroom, where she
sits on the toilet to pee.
SERA
(to herself)
The only thing I have to come
home to is a bottle of
Listerine to wash the taste
of come out of my mouth. I'm
tired of being alone... that's
what I'm tired of.
She finishes, wipes herself and flushes the toilet. Pulling
up her panties, she walks back into the bedroom, where Ben is
putting on his shoes.
SERA
Don't you like me, Ben?
BEN
(devastated)
Don't be silly?
Ben is unable to deal with the fact that he is absolutely in
love with her. He walks out of the room. She foolows.
SERA
We gotta decide this... right
now. Before we go any
further. You either stay here
with me or...
Ben turns to look at her.
SERA
... we can't see each other
any more.
Ben and Sera look at each other for a long time.
BEN
Sera... what you don't
understand is...
SERA
What?
Ben is deeply troubled. He comes to a decision.
BEN
You can never... never... ask
me to stop drinking. Do you
understand?
SERA
(dead serious)
I do. I really do.
(smiles)
OK. I have to do some
shopping alone. You go out
for a few drinks and then
pick up your things. Don't
hurry and I'll be back before
you to let you in.
Sera grabs him in a big embrace that knocks him off balance
and into the wall. She kisses him all over his face and
squeezes his skinny frame.
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Scene 37 - Packing Doubts
Ben is packing his liquor into his suitcase. The almost-empty
bottles he pours into a large cup, which he drinks from. The
suitcase is now full and Ben suddenly realizes that he hasn't
packed any clothes. They are all in a pile on the bed. He
talks to himself.
BEN
Maybe this isn't a good idea
after all.
He tries to put clothes in with the bottles, but the lid
won't close. He sits on the bed and has an imaginary
conversation with Sera.
BEN
Listen, angel... the thing is
that I'm nuts about you and
this is a bad thing... because
my real plan is to die here
and you were never even part
of my plan... but like I said,
I'm nuts about you... wait a
minute, I have an idea,
angel.
And he opens the closet and finds some plastic laundry bags,
which he puts his clothes in.
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Scene 38 - A Cheerful Distraction
Sera's neighbors, a husband and wife, are standing outside
her house. They stop her. They are also her landlord.
HUSBAND
We didn't know whether to
call the police or not.
And they indicate the sleeping figure of Ben, in the doorway,
clutching a bottle of bourbon, using hi suitcase as a pillow.
WIFE
He's been there for about
half an hour. My husband
thought he'd seen you two
together, but I thought it
best to wait until you got
home.
SERA
Yes, he's my friend. I guess
he just had a little too much
to drink.
(smiling uncomfortably)
I'll help him inside.
(puts down her packages)
Thanks for the concern. Sorry
to trouble you.
HUSBAND
(gallantly)
Well, call me if there's
anything I can do.
They go to their own house. Sera opens the front door, kneels
down next to Ben and shakes him gently.
SERA
Can you wake up?
Ben opens his eyes and looks around with a pleasant, cheerful
expression.
BEN
Hi!
SERA
Why don't you go in and sit
down. I have some gifts for
you.
BEN
Right... OK...
Ben stands and almost loses his balance. He picks up his
suitcase and attempts to pick up her packages as well, but
she stop him.
SERA
Don't worry... I got'em.
Ben staggers in with his case. As Sera enters, she looks
around and sees Husband and Wife at the window, still
watching.
BEN (off-screen)
Want a drink? Great nap.
Wanna go out tonight?
SERA
Seriously, Ben... I need to
keep pretty low-key around
here. Maybe next time you
could nap this side of the
door. That was the landlord.
BEN
Of course.
She reaches into her purse.
SERA
Gift number one.
And she gives him a newly cut key. He takes it and tries it
in the lock, then drops it into his pocket.
BEN
I used to carry a lot of
keys, but one by one they all
fell victim to the great
condensation. Now I have just
this one... which is...
And he tails off and stares at the floor. She waits for him
to continue and then comes to him and touches him on the arm.
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Scene 39 - Gifts of Connection
SERA
Ben?
BEN
Sorry.
He shakes his head.
BEN
I was miles away.
He sees the parcels.
BEN
Ah... more gifts. I have to
sit down for this.
He strides into the living room and flops on to the sofa. She
follows.
BEN
Sera, I love that
name... S.E.R.A. Before we
proceed onwards, there is
something I need to say. OK?
SERA
OK.
BEN
I've come this far... here I
am, in your house. I want you
to let me pay the rent for
this month. All right?
And he stares at her as if to say that nothing can happen
until this matter is resolved.
SERA
Why?
BEN
Because... it's better for me
that way. OK?
SERA
Well... OK...
She is uncomfortable.
They sit in silence for a while.
BEN
Sera... I hope that you
understand how I feel about
this. First of all, you're
welcome to my money. We can
buy a couple of cases of
liquor and you can have the
rest. But I don't think
you're talking to me right
now about money.
SERA
(smiling)
No?
BEN
No. I think you're talking
about you. I'll tell you
right now that I'm in love
with you... but, be that as it
may, I'm not here to force my
twisted life into your soul.
SERA
I know that...
BEN
... and I'm not here to demand
your attention to the point
where it changes your life.
We know I'm a drunk... but
that seems to be all right
with you. And I know that
you're a hooker. I hope you
understand that I'm a person
who is totally at ease with
this... which is not to say
that I'm indifferent or that
I don't care... I do... it
simply means that I trust and
accept your judgement. What
I'm saying is... that I hope
you understand that I
understand.
SERA
Thanks, I do understand. I
was worried about how that
would be... but now I'm not.
And you should know that
included with the rent here
is a complimentary blow job.
BEN
Ah, yes... I suppose sooner or
later we ought to fuck.
SERA
Whatever that means. Open
your presents.
She hands him the larger of the two parcels.
SERA
Open this one first.
Ben awkwardly unwraps the present, a large, colorful shirt. A
genuine smile comes on to his face.
BEN
Very nice.
He holds the shirt against himself.
BEN
This should work very nicely
with my suit, which, by the
way, is the only item of
clothing I brought over from
the motel with me.
Sera raise an eyebrow.
SERA
Right... the suitcase was
clinking. So what did you do
with your clothes?
BEN
(laughing)
I threw them into the
garbage., which was perhaps
immoral, but I wanted to come
to you clean, so to speak. I
thought we could go shopping
and pick up a pair of jeans
and forty-five pairs of
underwear and just throw them
out each day.
SERA
(smiling)
Nice talk, Ben. Keep
drinking. In between the
hundred and one proof breath
and the occasional drool,
some interesting words fall
from your mouth.
She hands him the last present.
SERA
Now, try this one.
Ben unwraps the smallest gift. It is a silver hip flask. He
is very touched and a little tear trickles down his cheek.
BEN
Well... looks like I'm with
the right girl.
He turns it in his hands.
BEN
I must say that I'm very
impressed that you would buy
this for me. I know you
wouldn't do this without
thinking about it.
Funny... you did just what I
would have done.
Ben stands and tries the flask in his pocket for fit. It is
fine. He walks to the door.
BEN
I'm going to fill it right
now.
SERA
Do you want to go gambling
tonight? We could go out and
play for a few hours.
Ben comes back into the room, takes the flask out of his suit
pocket and has a drink.
BEN
I hadn't planned to
gamble... but if you would
keep the bulk of my money
here, then I could safely
blow a couple of hundred
bucks.
He takes out all of his money, peels off a few hundreds and
then gives her the rest.
BEN
Giving you money makes me
want to come.
SERA
Then come.
(pause)
I'm going to change. Watch
TV. I'll be half an hour.
And she leaves. There is a slight edge to her voice and Ben
is not sure if he offended her or not. He watches through the
small angle of the door as she changes.
SERA
I am planning to go out and
do some work.
BEN
When?
SERA
Tomorrow night as a matter of
fact.
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Scene 40 - A Night of Chaos on The Strip
Ben and Sera walking. The camera follows them. He is wearing
his new shirt and looks good in it. She is wearing a green
dress and mismatched earrings and looks great. They walk and
talk.
BEN
I like your earrings.
He changes sides.
BEN
I like women who wear
mismatched earrings.
SERA
Well, then... I hope we don't
run into any tonight.
BEN
(laughs)
What do you mean?
SERA
I expect some kind of loyalty
here. Just because I fuck for
money doesn't give you cause
to start picking up women and
leaving me looking silly.
And she stops and looks at him, smiling but serious.
BEN
And I only have eyes for you.
And we both know that you
would never become
romantically involved with a
trick, right?
89 INT. CASINO - NIGHT
They walk around the huge space, which is full of people and
energy, and suddenly Ben grabs Sera and pushes her against a
slot machine and kisses her deeply. At first she resists and
then she gives in to him and responds. They knock over some
change, which falls to the floor, and Ben pulls from her a
beat to bend down and scoop up all the change and hand it to
the bemused player, before returning to Sera's mouth or more.
They break for air and then Ben leads her towards the bar. As
he waves to attract the barman's attention, she squeezes his
arm.
SERA
(quietly)
I love you.
But he doesn't hear her.
ANGLE ON CASINO ACTIVITY
On long lens we see Ben and Sera at the bar. Suddenly Ben
seems to fall asleep. Sera tries to wake him and then he
goes
crazy and falls backwards off his stool, knocking a waitress
and her drinks over. Security Guards appear and begin arguing
with Sera.
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Scene 41 - Morning After Chaos
Ben wakes up on the sofa, fully dressed. A night-light gives
a soft glow. He rolls off the sofa, landing on all fours on
the floor. He crawls to the kitchen , opens the fridge door
and takes out a vodka bottle and carton of orange juice. With
difficulty he gets to his feet, finds a glass and pour s a
drink. He swallows the mix and then stands over the sink just
in case he has to vomit.
91 INT. SERA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Sera wakes and Ben comes in and gets into bed with her.
SERA
How are you doing?
BEN
Very well... umm... I never
expected to have to ask you
this again... but how did our
evening go? I remember
getting to the casino... I
remember kissing you... that
was really nice but
everything after that is a
blank.
SERA
Well - I was prepared for
worse, but it wasn't so bad.
We were sitting at the bar,
talking about blackjack. You
seemed just fine, a little
drunker than usual, but
nothing really strange, but
then your head started to
droop and I put my arm on
your shoulder and then, wham,
you swung you arm at me, and
fell backwards off your stool
into a cocktail waitress. You
smashed everything on her
tray, it was a real mess. You
kept yelling and yelling.
BEN
Oh, and what did you do?
SERA
I tried to shut you up and
help you to your feet but you
kept swinging at me - not
like you wanted to hit me,
but more just waving me away.
Security came and when you
saw them you stopped yelling.
They wanted to carry you out
and dump you on the street,
but I talked them into
letting me walk you out.
BEN
That's impressive. How did
you do that?
SERA
I told them you were an
alcoholic and T would take
you home. I also promised
that we would never come in
there again.
BEN
We?
SERA
Yes, we.
BEN
(holds her hand)
What happened then?
SERA
You were OK for a while, so
we walked for about a block
and then you said you wanted
to go home and fuck, but I
think even you knew that
wasn't going to happen. We
got a cab and you asked him
to stop at a liquor store,
even though I told you that
we had plenty at home. In the
store you gave the kid a
hundred and told him to keep
the change. I asked you if
you knew it was a hundred.
You said you did, so I let
you do it. We got here, you
fell asleep on the couch and
I covered you up and came to
bed.
BEN
I warned you...
(kisses her hand)
... but I'm sorry.
SERA
Here's my speech...
(kisses his hand)
... I know this shouldn't be
acceptable to m, but it is.
Don't ask me why. I sense
that your trouble is very
big... and I'm scared for
you... and so I'm doing what I
think you need me to do.
Falling down in casinos is
little stuff. It doesn't
bother me. It has nothing to
do with us.
BEN
That's amazing. What are you?
Some sort of angel visiting
me from one of my drunk
fantasies? How can you be so
good?
She turns away to the wall and curls up like a small girl.
SERA
I don't know what you're
saying. I'm just using you. I
need you. Can we not talk
about it any more, please.
Not another word.
He thinks about this. He gently pushes her until she is lying
on her front and then he pulls up her nightdress and strokes
her naked back. He kisses her in the small of her back.
BEN
Why don't you go back to
sleep. I'll go out and buy us
some breakfast.
SERA
Be careful.
He stands and goes to the door.
BEN
Don't worry.
As he leaves the room, she calls after him.
SERA
Ben, I'm working tonight.
He opens the door and smiles at her.
BEN
I know.
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92 EXT. SIDEWALK - EARLY MORNING
Ben gets out of his cab and walks up to the doorway of a
grocery store. It is locked. Ben looks at his wrist and then
remembers that he no longer has a watch. He looks around,
sees something and exits frame.
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Scene 42 - Morning Mayhem at the Bar
Ben enters and makes his way to the bar. This is a dirty,
dark place. An ageing blonde in leather hot pants is dancing
by herself at the jukebox. A very drunk Biker Couple argue
noisily in a corner, slurring their words. There ins not much
gambling taking place at the eight slot machines. Ben sits at
the bar and the Bartender slaps down a paper napkin.
BEN
A beer and a double kamikaze
please.
BARTENDER
Sure thing. Anything to eat?
BEN
Not quite yet. First I have
to drink myself sober,
then... a few crackers, maybe
an egg and toast...
The Bartender walks away to get Ben's drinks, Ben continues
anyway.
BEN
... then I'll go home with the
groceries and we'll have
breakfast together, and
that'll make her feel better
about my condition...
Ben is interrupted by the arrival of the Biker Girl. She is
young tough and pretty. She puts an arm around him and
presses against him.
BIKER GIRL
Who the fuck are you talking
to, Mr?
(laughing)
Why are you all dressed up,
honey? My, don't you look
fine.
She runs her tongue around her mouth.
BIKER GIRL
I am very bored with my date.
Would you like to buy me a
drink?
Ben looks around and sees the Biker staring at the two of
them.
BEN
(loudly)
Do you mind if I buy her a
drink?
BIKER
Fuck her. I don't care what
the fuck you do with her.
BEN
Maybe I could buy you both a
drink?
BIKER
Fuck you. Don't fuck with me,
motherfucker. Fuck off. Go to
it, she's waiting for her
drink.
The Biker walks over to the slot machine and begins dropping
in quarters, never taking his eyes off Ben and the Girl.
BIKER GIRL
See what an asshole he is.
(big smile)
I'll have a rum and Coke.
BEN
Barman? A rum and Coke,
please.
The Girl leans with her back to the bar, closer to Ben , who
is facing the bar on a stool. She brings her face closer to
his.
BIKER GIRL
Can I stay with you for a
while?
BEN
You mean move in with me?
Isn't this a bit sudden?
BIKER GIRL
Oh, I don't have a lot of
stuff.
BEN
(smiling)
I don't think my wife would
dig it too much.
She moves to his ear to whisper.
BIKER GIRL
Maybe we could just go find a
room and fuck all day. You
wouldn't have to tell your
wife about that, would you? I
could suck you like this.
And she begins sucking on his lobe. Behind them. At the slot
machine the Biker is still watching. His face fills with a
drunken rage.
BEN
See, the thing is... fucking
you would be wonderful, but I
am deeply in love with
Sera...
The Biker throws down his beer can and walks towards the bar.
BEN
... and it's almost impossible
for me to imagine being with
someone else...
The Biker arrives at the bar and grabs Ben.
BIKER
Now listen, asshole, I'm not
gonna just sit around and
watch her suck on your ear.
The Biker is about to hit Ben then holds back. He leans in
and puts his face next to Ben's.
BIKER
Now, I know that she came
over to you, like she does,
so I'm gonna pretend that
you're innocent and give you
one chance to walk out of
this place... right now.
BIKER GIRL
(to biker)
Get lost, jerk.
The Biker slaps her and then grabs Ben by the collar.
BIKER
What do you say?
Ben shakes his arm free from the Biker's grip. He thinks
about it for a couple of beats and then decides.
BEN
I'm sorry... but she and I
have decided to spend a few
hours together in a mo -
The Biker headbutts Ben in the face, sending him crashing off
his stool to the floor. His head cracks against the tiled
floor. The Biker walks over to him, picks him up by his shirt
front and punches him in the nose. Blood sprays on to his
face. The Biker walks out of the bar. The Girl follows him
quickly. The Bartender takes a wet towel and walks over to
where Ben is struggling to get up, holding his face.
BARTENDER
You're quite a fighter.
He gives him the towel.
BARTENDER
This may sound silly, but I'm
going to have to ask you to
leave. It's what we do around
here when there's a fight.
Men's room is around the
back.
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Scene 43 - A Morning of Care and Confusion
Ben lets himself in with his key. He is carrying a big bag of
groceries. His clothes are bloodstained. The Landlady watches
from poolside.
BEN
I'm back.
He walks into the living room and finds Sera reading on the
couch. She looks up and sees his face and his
bloodstained
shirt.
SERA
Oh, no! Oh, fuck, Ben, look
at your face. You get in a
fight? I thought you didn't
fight. Goddammit. How do you
feel? Wait here. Sit down.
She goes to the bathroom and we hear her rummaging in the
medicine cabinet.
SERA (off-screen)
Did you stop at the bar?
She comes back into the room, armed with bottles and cotton
wool.
SERA
Did you say something stupid
to someone stupid?
She goes to work on his face, dabbing an open cut with some
mercurochrome.
BEN
Absolutely not... ow... I was
defending the honor of some
poor wayward maiden.
She thinks about this for a moment and then kisses him on the
forehead.
SERA
Why don't you go and finish
this in the bathroom. Take a
shower and put on your other
shirt. I'll fix breakfast and
then we'll go shopping and
get some new clothes. I think
this suit must be unlucky.
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95 INT. MALL - DAY
Ben and Sera come out of a clothing store. Ben is wearing
black jeans, red socks and a white dress shirt. They go up
the 'up' escalator.
SERA
Very creative. Now we can get
you a black bow tie and you
can look like one of those
casino dealers.
BEN
OK, but remember that they
wear it because they have to.
I wear it because I want to.
That'll make me look
different. Let's get a drink.
Ben somehow gets on the 'down' escalator, leaving Sera on the
higher level.
SERA
Ben?
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Scene 44 - Fractured Moments
Ben needs a drink badly but this is not the best place.
Mothers with children, old people and a Waitress with
attitude. Ben tries to order but becomes angry when she
doesn't bring it straight away. People begin staring. At the
next table a dignified older man sits alone.
Ben hands Sera a small package.
CLOSE ANGLE
BEN
There was no time for me to
write a card, with you
breathing down my neck all
day., so you'll just have to
wing it, baby.
He laughs and this induces a coughing fit. He downs his drink
and holds up the empty glass to let the waitress know she
should bring another.
BEN
Open it.
She does so. It is a pair of onyx earrings. Black onyx set in
white gold.
SERA
(pleased)
Your color.
BEN
I think you should wear one
at a time. One of these... and
one of your others. In fact,
I was going to buy just one,
but I didn't think it would
fly... as a gift, I mean.
His new drink arrives and he takes a swallow straight away.
SERA
I'll wear them tonight... one
of them.
She looks at him, aware of what she has said, wondering how
he is reacting. She smiles and Ben takes a deep swallow,
finishing his drink. His mood suddenly changes.
BEN
Yes... tonight. Put it on.
She does so. Ben helps her, bringing his face down close to
hers.
BEN
You'll be able to feel it,
sharp and hot under your ear,
as one of the brothers is
driving your head, face down
into one of the penthouse
pillows.
They are both suddenly deeply shocked by what he has said.
They sit in silence for a while. Sera is close to tears. Ben
gets up suddenly, puts down a couple of bills and walks away
from the table. When he is almost at the door Sera gets up
and quickly tries together up all of the packages.
SERA
Ben, wait... please wait for
me.
ANGLE ON THE DOOR
The dignified older Man stands in Ben's path and places his
hands on Ben's shoulders.
MAN
Maybe you should wait for
her, sir.
BEN
Why?
MAN
Because... you can hear in her
voice that she really wants
you to.
Sera catches up and the Man lets go of Ben. Ben takes the
packages from Sera and the two of them step out into the
mall.
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Scene 45 - Tension in the Mall
They walk together.
SERA
What was that all about?
BEN
Can we just forget it?
SERA
I don't understand any of
that.
BEN
Can we just ignore it?
They stop and look at each other. The PA system gives an
inane message.
BEN
Please!
SERA
Yes... I'll give you that.
BEN
Thank you, Sera.
SERA
Do you want me not to go
tonight?
BEN
No... we already talked about
that.
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Scene 46 - A Night of Transformation
Sera is preparing for work. In the background we can hear the
TV next door. She dresses carefully. Black underwear,
stockings, heels, a tight black skirt.
99 INT. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
Ben is watching TV and drinking.
100 INT. SERA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Sera at the mirror, putting on her make-up. Her make-up is
more pronounced than we have seen it before . Everything
is
more extreme.
101 INT. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
Sera comes into the room. Ben looks up at her and sucks in
his breath.
BEN
Wow.
She walks over to him and takes his head and places it
between her breasts and kisses the top of his head.
BEN
Maybe I should follow you
around and ask one of your
tricks what it's like to
sleep with you.
SERA
They wouldn't know.
She comes on to him.
SERA
Maybe you should ask me
sometime. I'd be happy to
show you.
She goes to the door.
SERA
I'll be back home around
three. If you're back by then
we can watch TV or
something... I guess what I'm
saying is... that I hope you
are back when I get home.
Please be careful.
BEN
You be careful to. I'm going
to miss you.
SERA
Shall we go away for a couple
of days?
BEN
Yeah... I'd like that.
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Scene 47 - Underwater Connection
Sera walks through the lobby, looking for business.
103 EXT. A STREET - NIGHT
Ben lying down with people walking past and over him.
ANGLE ON BEN'S FACE
A big smile appears on his face. He starts to laugh.
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104 EXT. DESSERT - DAY
A blue car drives across frame. The sun is bright.
105 EXT. DESERT MOTEL, POOL - DAY
Sera is a very good swimmer and we see that Ben must have
been quite an athlete. They look at each other under water.
They're under water for a long time. Ben exhales. Sera pushes
him towards the surface.
Ben and Sera come to the surface. Ben has swallowed water and
has a coughing fit. Sera hugs him until the fit passes. The
camera moves in tighter on them and music gives the moment a
strange chill.
SERA
Don't do that to me. Don't
frighten me like that.
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Scene 48 - Reflections by the Pool
Ben and Sera are watching the TV next to the poll. They are
sitting in reclining chairs. Inn the distance a coyote howls.
SERA
Years ago, in LA, I turned a
trick on Sunset and Western.
The guy was polite and didn't
argue about the price. He
parked his car and I took him
to a house that I had an
arrangement with. A fat
Mexican woman was watching a
TV and I told him to give her
the twenty for the room.
There were three or four
small naked children playing
on the floor and we had to
step over them to get into
the room. The room had a bed
and a dresser. He lay on his
back on the bed and I put a
rubber on him and sucked him
for a while until he was hard
and then I eased on to him.
About twenty minutes later
there was a knock on the door
and it was the woman saying
our time was up. I felt kind
of guilty because he hadn't
come and I offered to reason
with the woman and get
another ten minutes, but he
said it was all right and
began dressing. When we were
ready to leave the room he
stopped me and... hugged me
and kissed me on the cheek.
He gave me an extra hundred
as a tip and went back to his
car. I remember being
relieved that I wouldn't have
to work again that evening.
BEN
Last spring I happened to
walk past a house that I had
once patronized. There was a
cool breeze blowing off the
ocean and through the window
I could see a bare leg. The
girl must have been taking a
break between customers. It
was a strange moment for me
because it reminded me of my
mother and despite the fact
that I was late for something
already I just stayed there,
loving the atmosphere of it
and my memory and... the
reason I'm telling you this
epilogue is that I felt that
I'd come full circle.
SERA
Where was that house? The one
in LA, I mean.
BEN
Fifth and Mayflower. You know
it?
SERA
Yes. One of my friends was
there. I wonder if you ever
clipped her.
They watch the TV in silence for a while. Sera holds his
hand.
BEN
I like it here with you.
SERA
Let's stay for a while.
BEN
OK.
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Scene 49 - Poolside Recklessness
Ben mixes a cocktail for himself, then one for Sera. The
camera follows him as he goes...
108 EXT. POOL-SIDE - DAY
... to the side of the pool, where Sera is sunbathing. He
lowers himself unsteadily into the chair but avoids spilling
a drop of the drinks, which he puts down on to a glass-topped
table. He is pretty loaded. Sera turns over and moves out of
his shadow.
SERA
I've missed the best sun. Why
did you have to pawn your
watch?
BEN
I didn't know I'd ever need
it again.
Sera gets up, takes a drink and then walks to the diving
board. As she takes a position at the end, she pulls the
bathing suit out from her bottom, does a very natural dive
into the pool, swims a length under water and then comes out
near Ben, pulls herself out of the pool in one move and bends
down and kisses Ben for a long time. Ben responds and kisses
back. There is no one else around the pool.
The kiss becomes heated and urgent and Sera sits on Ben,
making him wet from her. He pushes the top of her suit down
and kisses her breasts. She picks up the glass and drinks,
letting the alcohol spill from her mouth, over her breasts.
Ben drinks from her.
BEN
Take this off.
He tries to pull her swimsuit down.
SERA
Maybe we should go inside.
Come on.
She stands up, covering herself. Ben stands up, laughing,
loses his balance and slips on the wet concrete. He falls
backwards, half on to the chair, which he breaks, and then on
to the glass table. The table goes over and it and the
glasses all shatter on the concrete. Ben falls on the broken
glass and cuts himself all over his back and his arms. Glass
goes into the pool. Blood mingles with the water on the
steaming cement.
BEN
Whoops.
Sera picks up her towel and lays it down next to him. She
kneels and helps him up, trying to pullout the little bits of
glass sticking to him. Ben stands unsteadily.
BEN
I'll go and clean up. Perhaps
you could take care of this.
He indicates the mess, then walks to their room. Sera begins
carefully picking up the broken glass. The desk clerc appears
with a broom and a dustpan.
DESK-CLERK
(cheerfully)
Everybody OK?
SERA
Yes, fine. Don't worry. We'll
pay for the chair, and I'll
clean all this up, the pool
too.
DESK-CLERK
Don't worry.
He begins sweeping the broken glass into the pan, cheerfully
ignoring Sera.
SERA
You seem prepared for
accidents.
DESK-CLERK
(still smiling)
Yeah... we get a lot of screw-
ups here.
He looks directly at Sera.
DESK-CLERK
Now, you two keep you loud
talk and your liquor to your
room. Check out first thing
tomorrow and after that I
don't want to see either of
you here again. I don't need
you paying for the chair or
cutting your pretty hands on
the glass. Let's leave it at
that.
Nodding firmly, he goes back to the mess, indicating that the
conversation is over.
DESK-CLERK
See ya in the morning.
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Scene 50 - Love in the Shadows
Sera comes into the room.
SERA
Ben?
She sees that he is already asleep on the bed, his half-naked
body covered with countless bits of bloodstained tissue. The
image has an almost religious feel to it. The TV is on and a
sitcom is playing.
Something funny catches Sera's attention. She laughs and sits
on the bed next to Ben.
SERA (voice-over)
I think we realized that we
didn't have long and accepted
it. My charm, for him, was
that I accepted him exactly
as he was and didn't expect
him to change. I think we
both realized that about each
other. Ben needed me and I
liked his drama. I loved him.
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110 EXT. DESERT LANDSCAPE - DUSK
We see Las Vegas lighting up. The blue rental car passes
through frame and drives towards the town.
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Scene 51 - Silent Struggles
Ben wakes from a dream. He is fully clothed and very
agitated.
BEN
Sera?
112 INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT
Sera is cooking.
SERA
I'm in here. You probably
don't want to hear about it
right now, but I bought some
plain rice. I thought it
might be something you could
eat. So if you get hungry
later on, just let me know.
Ben comes in from the kitchen and takes vodka bottles from
the fridge.
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114 scene cut.
115 INT. BATHROOM - NIGHT
Ben's hands are sweating and it's difficult for him to keep
hold of the bottle as he drinks. He gets most of it down and
then he hunches over the sink and immediately vomits. He
takes the second bottle and tries again.
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116 INT. SHOWER - NIGHT
Still holding the bottle, Ben stands in the shower. He drinks
some more and closes his eyes.
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117 INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT
Ben enters, smartly dressed and smiling.
BEN
I think I'm ready for the
rice!
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118 INT. DINING ROOM - LATER THAT NIGHT
Ben and Sera sitting opposite each other. He has a bowl of
rice, which he is pretending to eat in between sips of vodka.
She has a bowl of vegetables and rice. She sits, silently for
a while, and then puts down her chopsticks.
SERA
You're pretty sick.
Ben looks away.
SERA
What are you going to do?
She folds her arms.
SERA
I want you to go see a
doctor.
He thinks for a while and then turns to meet her gaze. They
look right into each other's eyes.
BEN
Sera... I'm not going to see a
doctor.
Sera continues to look at him almost defiantly.
BEN
Maybe it's time I moved to a
hotel.
SERA
And do what... rot away in a
room?
(becoming angry)
We're not going to talk about
that. Fuck you! I will not
talk about that. You're
staying here. You are not
moving to a hotel.
BEN
Will you lighten up, please?
SERA
(close to tears)
One thing... one thing... this
is one thing you can do for
me. I've given you gallons of
free will here! You can do
this for me.
She leans right forward.
SERA
Let's face it. Sick as you
are, I'm probably the only
thing that's keeping you
alive.
She stands up
SERA
I have to go to work now.
Ben doesn't say anything. He just stares a hole in his bowl
of rice.
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Scene 52 - High Stakes and Temptation
Ben walks by himself. He is deep in thought.
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120 INT. CASINO - NIGHT
Ben recklessly bets two hundred dollars at the craps
table... and wins. As he leans forward to collect his
winnings, he sees...
ANGLE:
... a Blonde in a very low-cut outfit. She smiles at Ben and
walks around the table to pick him up. Ben puts all of his
winnings on one bet and wins again. This pattern repeats a
few times and drinks are on the house.
BLONDE
Hey... that was quite a play.
You in for the convention?
Ben gets to the point.
BEN
I'd like to fuck you.
A few people hear Ben and the Blonde is almost put off, but
he does have about eight thousand dollars in winnings and so
she leans in very close so that she can talk quietly.
BLONDE
I'm very expensive.
BEN
How much to lick your pussy?
The Blonde picks up a sizeable stack of chips and looks at
Ben.
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Scene 53 - Betrayal Unveiled
Sera lets herself in, looks around and opens the bedroom
door.
ANGLE:
In one fluid movement the naked blonde gets off the semi-
conscious Ben, pulls her dress over her head and walks past
Sera. Moments later we hear the front door slam. Ben comes to
and looks at Sera. He is more or less unaware of what has
just happened.
BEN
Hello...
ANGLE ON SERA
Her eyes are wet.
SERA
There are limits.
BEN
(remembering)
Yes... I guess I knew that.
Ben gets out of the bed. He picks up the bottle on the
bedside table and stands.
BEN
Perhaps I could crash on the
couch for a few hours... and
then I'll leave.
He walks out of the room and closes his the door. Camera
moves in on Sera. She covers her face with her hands. She
drops her purse and slides down the wall to the floor,
weeping quietly.
SERA (v.o)
I heard the door slam a
couple of hours later and he
was gone.
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122 EXT. STREET - DAY
Ben coming out of a liquor store with a large brown bag.
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123 EXT. STREET - NIGHT
Sera getting out of a car. The car drives off. Sera examines
her face in a pocket mirror. Puts on more lipstick.
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124 INT. MOTEL ROOM - DAY
Ben is on all fours in the bathroom trying to vomit. His thin
frame is heaving. Bottles everywhere.
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Scene 54 - Negotiating on The Strip
Three college boys with beer bottles walk the The Strip. They
are all wearing the same numbered jersey. Nice middle-class
boys looking for an adventure. They see Sera and go into a
huddle before walking over to her.
TALLEST COLLEGE BOY
How much will it cost us to
fuck you?
The other two College Boys titter. Sera starts to walk away
and then hesitates.
SERA
Sorry, guys, but I don't know
what you mean. Anyway, I
never date more than one guy
at a time.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
Come on... we got money... show
her the money.
The other College Boy gets out his wallet and opens it to
show her. Sera hesitates, not somehow comfortable with the
situation, then goes ahead.
SERA
How much of that money did
you guys want to spend?
TALLEST COLLEGE BOY
How much you want? How about
two hundred for an hour?
SERA
(becoming annoyed with them)
Don't your friends talk?
(no answer)
Try three-hundred for a half
hour.
OTHER COLLEGE BOY
(nervous)
Three hundred for the hour.
SERA
OK... three... and we'll see
how it goes. Where are you
staying?
TALLEST COLLEGE BOY
The Yukon, room twenty-four.
SERA
I'll see you there in fifteen
minutes. You can pay me then.
Why don't you all take a
shower while you're waiting.
OTHER COLLEGE BOY
A shower? In fifteen minutes?
SERA
Look... I'll only need one of
you at a time. RIGHT?
UNDERSTOOD? So... the other
two can shower while I'm
there. OK?
They walk off in a huddle, giggling - three small boys.
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Scene 55 - Negotiation Turned Violent
Sera drinks from a beer bottle as she approaches their room.
She talks to herself.
SERA
Where are the boys this
weekend, Frank? Why, hell,
Charlie, I sent 'em off to
learn the one thing I
couldn't teach 'em.
She looks at the numbers and finds the room. She knocks and a
moment later the Tallest College Boy opens the door in his
jockey shorts.
127 INT. MOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
Sera steps in. One boy is coming out of the bathroom wearing
a towel and the third is sitting in a chair smoking a
cigarette, which he passes to the boy in the towel. The other
boy is fooling around with a video camera. The atmosphere is
weird and Sera is suddenly alert.
The Tallest College Boy hands her the money. He is very well
built, a football player. Sera hesitates, holding the money.
The Tallest College Boy closes the door and then leans
against it. They are all staring at her now. No one says
anything. Sera smiles suddenly and puts the money in her
purse. All business.
SERA
OK... where's the bedroom, and
who's first?
They all look at each other.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
I want to fuck her in the
butt...
He looks at the other.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
... you too, right?
SERA
Forget that. No one's doing
that. You'll all go one at a
time. I f you want I'll suck
you instead, but that's all.
Then I'm out of here.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
(looking at tallest)
You said I could fuck her in
the butt.
OTHER COLLEGE BOY
Shut up.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
(shouting)
It's my fucking money)
SERA
That's it... Take your money
back. I'm leaving.
The Smallest College Boy gets off the bed and comes over to
Sera.
SMALLEST COLLEGE BOY
No... don't go.
The Tallest Boy is still standing in front of the door and
things are getting strange. The Other Boy turns on the video
camera. Sera loses her cool.
SERA
(to the Smallest Boy)
Maybe you'd like to fuck one
of your friends in the butt
instead.
The room goes very quiet. The kid tears up. Sera tries to
back-pedal.
SERA
Hey... I'm sorry...
The kid punches her hard in the stomach, knocking her to the
ground.
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Close-up on Sera's face pushed into a bloodstained pillow,
her body being pounded from behind. The naked legs of two of
the boys behind her. We hear voices, filtered, from a long
way off.
VOICE
Go on... fuck her ass...
OTHER VOICE
Look at me... look at
me... look at me.
A hand comes into frame and pulls her head up by the hair. A
pair of legs moves in. There is the sound of a punch.
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FADE IN:
Sera's body on the floor. In the background trousers being
hastily pulled on to legs. The boys exit with sport bags.
The last one turns out the lights and closes the door.
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Scene 56 - Silent Suffering
In the half-light Sera gets up and walks with difficulty to
the bathroom.
129 INT. BATHROOM - DAWN
She clicks on the mirror light. Her face is awful. One eye is
swollen almost shut. Her top lip is cut.
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130 INT. CAB - EARLY MORNING
Sera gets into the cab with considerable difficulty. The cab
driver is a cynic.
CAB DRIVER
What's the matter, honey, get
a back-door delivery you
weren't expecting? You gonna
be able to pay the fare?
Without speaking she takes out a twenty, leans forward and
drops it on the front passenger seat. He drives. Looks at her
in the mirror.
CAB DRIVER
Oh, don't wanna talk to me,
unh? Well, don't take it out
on me, I'm just covering my
ass. What the hell do you
expect, stuttin' around like
that... dressed like that? You
oughta be glad the creep
didn't nail ya.
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Scene 57 - A Fragile Farewell
As the cab drives off, Sera walks slowly to the door.
Her Landlord's wife passes and takes in her face.
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132 INT. SERA'S SHOWER - DAY
Sera is slumped on the floor of the shower, her arms hugging
her legs, the water pounding down on her.
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133 INT. SERA'S HOUSE - DAY
Sera opens the door and we see the Landlord. Behind him, on
the sidewalk, we can see his wife. He is embarrassed.
ANGLE
Sera, wearing dark glasses. She looks terrible. Her mouth is
swollen and some of the bruising around her eye is visible.
LANDLADY
I'm sorry... but we'd like you
out by the end of the week.
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134 EXT. WHOLE YEAR INN - DAY
Sera gets out of a cab and goes into reception. She is
wearing huge dark glasses to hide the black eye and the
bruising.
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Scene 58 - Vulnerability on The Strip
The desk clerk is wearing a shirt of Ben's that we recognize
from an earlier scene.
DESK CLERK
I'm sorry, ma'am. He never
checked back in.
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136 EXT. THE STRIP - NIGHT
Sera walks alone. She's dejected as she looks for Ben.
137 INT. CASINO - NIGHT
Sera comes to an elevator and waits. She is wearing a thin
black top without a bra. Her bruised face makes her suddenly
very conspicuous and vulnerable. A big man in a white stetson
stands next to her. He looks at her and grins. She smiles,
coldly. He takes from his pocket two black, hundred dollar
chips, places one in each hand and deliberately places each
one against her nipples. Other people see this and stop and
watch. Sera looks down at his hands and stares until the man
becomes uncomfortable.
STETSON MAN
What's the problem,
honey?... You on strike?
And he walks away laughing.
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Scene 59 - Descent into Desperation
Sera is sitting on a freshly-painted red kerb. She smokes a
cigarette and doesn't give a damn that her short skirt is
somewhat revealing. Opposite her a bum is sleeping on the
pavement. For a moment it looks like Ben. The camera comes in
tight on to her face. She looks more lost that we've ever
seen her. She drinks coffee from a styrofoam cup. The sun is
bright and hot and traffic is noisy.
139 INT. DOCTOR'S OFFICE - DAY
Improvised scene. (5)
140 INT. CASINO - NIGHT
Sera comes in and the camera follows her as she makes her way
to the bar. She has covered up much of the bruising with
make-up but it is still pretty obvious. In wide shot we see
her strike up a conversation with the man next to her at the
bar.
CLOSE SHOT - THE BAR
A hand comes in to shot and grips her arm firmly. We see that
it is a casino security guard.
SERA
Let go. What's the problem.
SECURITY GUARD
We don't want you in here,
that's the problem. Let's go.
And he jerks her arm. People are watching now.
SERA
Don't worry... If you don't
want me in here, then I don't
want to be in here. Just let
go of my arm and I'll walk
out of here.
SECURITY GUARD
Yeah... we'll both walk out
now.
He steers her firmly across the floor.
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141 EXT. CASINO. NIGHT
They reach the sidewalk and, without relaxing his grip, he
grabs her between the legs with his free hand and says in her
ear:
SECURITY GUARD
Next time it won't be so
fucking easy.
And he pushes her towards the street and walks back into the
Casino. Sera is shocked. She looks around and the group of
people who have stopped to watch the event move away.
142 INT. SERA'S HOUSE - DAY
Sera is throwing clothes into a suitcase. The phone rings.
She thinks about it for a long time and then it stops. She
carries on packing and then the phone rings again. She pick
it up.
SERA
Hello... hello...
(suddenly alert)
Ben? Where the fuck are you?
Give me the address.
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Scene 60 - Desperate Connections
The driver is black and friendly. The radio drones quietly -
a religious program. The Rev. Ike is taking listeners' calls.
BLACK DRIVER
What in the hell happened to
you, Miss?
SERA
Oh... it was an argument.
BLACK DRIVER
Leave him, Miss. Pretty girl
like You could get any man
that You wanted.
144 INT. BEN'S MOTEL ROOM - DUSK
The door opens. Ben is naked. His body looks bad. Leaving the
door open, he retreats to the bed.
145 INT. BEN'S MOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
Sera comes in, closing the door behind her. The shades are
drawn and the room is gloomy. Ben has got back into bed. She
comes to the bed and sits.
SERA
Ben... I've been looking for
You. Have You been here since
You left? It smells bad in
here. It's so dark.
She clicks on the bedside light and is truly shocked by his
face.
BEN
I wanted to see you...
SERA
Oh, Ben... you look so very
sick... my love... you're so
pale.
She goes to the bathroom and returns with a wet face-cloth.
She wipes his face.
BEN
I wanted to see you... you're
my angel.
He sits up painfully and finds a bottle, summoning up some
last strength to drink. His entire body shudders as he drains
the bottle. He puts it down and focuses on her for the first
time. H sees her damaged face, touches her face, looks at her
questioningly.
SERA
Something went wrong... I'm
OK.
Ben begins to cry and that sets her off.
BEN
I'm sorry I put us asunder.
She shakes her head, unable to speak for the moment. She gets
into bed with him, kissing his face. She caresses his whole
body, which is shaking, possessed by an uncontrollable fever.
BEN
See how hard You make me
angel.
She excites him with her hand, kissing his face gently. When
he is about to come, she straddles him and brings him inside.
As he comes, he opens his eyes wide and looks at her.
BEN
You know I love you... yeah?
SERA
(she comes)
Yes.
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FADE IN:
Sera is sleeping. A sudden gasp wakes her. Ben is having a
spasm. Suddenly his body relaxes. He turns his head, opens
his eyes wide and looks straight at her.
BEN
Oh... I'm so sorry...
He smiles and turns his head away. He is very still.
SERA
Ben... Ben... Ben?
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146 INT. BEN'S MOTEL ROOM - NIGHT
In the darkened room we can just make out Sera sitting on the
bed, looking at the still form of Ben.
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147 EXT. STREET NEAR MOTEL - DAWN
Sera walking. A paramedic van goes past with its lights
flashing. The soundtrack is empty - silent. We slowly fade in
theme music and titles start to roll.
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Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
Character | Arc | Critique | Suggestions |
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ben | Ben's character arc follows his descent into deeper alcoholism and self-destruction, leading to a pivotal moment where he confronts the consequences of his actions. Initially, he is portrayed as a charming yet troubled man, seeking connection but often pushing people away. As the story progresses, his struggles intensify, culminating in a crisis that forces him to confront his demons. This moment of reckoning leads to a period of reflection and vulnerability, where he begins to acknowledge his flaws and the impact of his choices on those around him, particularly Sera. Ultimately, Ben's arc concludes with a tentative step towards recovery and self-acceptance, as he learns to embrace his vulnerabilities and seek help, hinting at the possibility of a healthier future. | While Ben's character arc is compelling and showcases a range of emotional depth, it risks becoming predictable if not handled with nuance. The portrayal of his struggles with alcoholism and self-destructive behavior is relatable, but the arc could benefit from more distinct turning points that challenge his character in unexpected ways. Additionally, the relationship with Sera, while central to his emotional journey, could be further developed to explore how their dynamic influences his growth and decisions. | To improve Ben's character arc, consider introducing more varied challenges that force him to confront his issues in different contexts, such as professional setbacks or conflicts with friends. This could add layers to his character and prevent the narrative from feeling repetitive. Additionally, deepening the relationship with Sera by exploring their shared history or introducing moments of conflict could enhance the emotional stakes. Incorporating a mentor or a support figure who challenges Ben's perspective on recovery could also provide a fresh dynamic and facilitate his growth. Finally, ensure that his moments of clarity and vulnerability are balanced with setbacks, creating a more realistic portrayal of the recovery process. |
sera | Sera's character arc begins with her as a mysterious figure caught in a web of exploitation and manipulation, struggling to maintain her sense of self amidst the chaos of her life as a sex worker. As the story progresses, she reveals her vulnerabilities and emotional scars, particularly in her interactions with Ben, which challenge her perceptions of intimacy and connection. Throughout the screenplay, Sera evolves from a guarded and defensive character to one who embraces her strength and resilience, ultimately taking control of her narrative. By the climax, she confronts her past traumas and the abusive dynamics in her relationships, leading to a moment of empowerment where she asserts her independence and seeks a healthier connection with Ben. The arc concludes with Sera finding a balance between her vulnerability and strength, allowing her to navigate her world with newfound agency and hope for genuine companionship. | Sera's character arc is compelling and rich with emotional depth, but it could benefit from clearer milestones that mark her transformation. While her journey from vulnerability to empowerment is evident, the screenplay may lack specific turning points that highlight her growth. Additionally, the complexity of her character can sometimes lead to confusion about her motivations and desires, making it challenging for the audience to fully connect with her journey. The balance between her strength and vulnerability is well portrayed, but there may be moments where her emotional shifts feel abrupt or underexplored, potentially detracting from the overall impact of her arc. | To improve Sera's character arc, consider incorporating more defined turning points that clearly illustrate her growth and transformation. These could include pivotal moments where she confronts her past, makes significant choices that reflect her evolving sense of self, or experiences setbacks that challenge her resilience. Additionally, deepening her backstory could provide context for her emotional struggles, allowing the audience to empathize more with her journey. It may also be beneficial to explore her relationships with other characters beyond Ben, as these interactions could further illuminate her complexities and enhance her development. Finally, ensuring that her emotional shifts are gradual and well-supported by the narrative will help maintain audience engagement and investment in her character. |
yuri | Yuri begins as a charismatic and seemingly generous figure, using his charm to manipulate those around him, particularly Sera. As the narrative unfolds, his darker tendencies emerge, revealing a controlling and abusive side that alienates him from Sera and the businessmen. His initial confidence begins to erode as his instability increases, leading to moments of violent outbursts and emotional volatility. By the climax, Yuri's facade crumbles, exposing his vulnerability and desperation for control. Ultimately, he faces the consequences of his actions, leading to a potential downfall that forces him to confront his inner demons, leaving the audience questioning whether redemption is possible for a character so deeply flawed. | Yuri's character arc effectively showcases the transformation from a charming manipulator to a menacing abuser, but it risks becoming one-dimensional if not handled with care. The portrayal of his vulnerability is crucial, yet it may not be fully realized in the screenplay. The audience might struggle to empathize with him if his moments of tenderness are not adequately developed or if they feel inconsistent with his abusive behavior. Additionally, the escalation of his instability could benefit from clearer motivations and backstory to avoid appearing as a mere plot device. | To improve Yuri's character arc, consider providing more depth to his backstory, exploring the traumas that shaped him into the manipulative figure he is. This could involve flashbacks or dialogue that reveals his past relationships and experiences, allowing the audience to understand his motivations better. Additionally, balance his moments of aggression with more nuanced interactions that showcase his internal conflict, making his vulnerability feel authentic rather than forced. Finally, ensure that his downfall is not just a consequence of his actions but also a moment of self-realization, allowing for a more complex and potentially redemptive conclusion. |
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
Pattern | Explanation |
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Tone and Emotional Impact | Scenes with a melancholic or emotional tone tend to have higher emotional impact scores. For instance, scenes 7, 11, and 31, which feature a melancholic tone, consistently score well in emotional impact, suggesting that the author effectively evokes emotions through this tone. |
Dialogue Quality and Character Development | Scenes with high dialogue scores (e.g., scenes 23, 36, and 60) also show significant character changes and emotional depth. This indicates that the author’s dialogue not only drives the plot but also facilitates character development, enhancing the overall narrative. |
Conflict and High Stakes | Scenes that are rated high in conflict (e.g., scenes 29, 54, and 56) also tend to have high stakes, suggesting that the author effectively intertwines conflict with the narrative's tension, which keeps the audience engaged. |
Intimacy and Vulnerability | Scenes characterized by intimacy and vulnerability (e.g., scenes 38, 46, and 60) often score high in emotional impact and character changes. This suggests that the author’s exploration of intimate moments resonates well with the audience, enhancing the emotional depth of the story. |
Seductive Tone and Character Engagement | Scenes with a seductive tone (e.g., scenes 2, 3, and 6) tend to have high overall grades and character engagement scores. This indicates that the author’s use of seductive elements effectively captivates the audience and maintains their interest in character arcs. |
Reflective Tone and Plot Advancement | Scenes that are reflective (e.g., scenes 9, 18, and 22) often have lower scores in moving the story forward. This suggests that while reflective moments add depth, they may slow down the narrative pace, indicating a potential area for balancing reflection with plot progression. |
Intensity and Emotional Resonance | Scenes rated as intense (e.g., scenes 36, 42, and 55) show a strong correlation with high emotional impact scores. This suggests that the author’s ability to create intensity in scenes effectively resonates with the audience, enhancing their emotional experience. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates a strong command of emotional depth, character dynamics, and tension-building through dialogue. The writer effectively captures complex relationships and internal conflicts, creating engaging narratives. However, there are opportunities for improvement in areas such as pacing, character development, and the use of subtext in dialogue.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
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Book | 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book provides practical insights into structuring scenes and developing characters, which can help improve pacing and character arcs. |
Screenplay | 'Glengarry Glen Ross' by David Mamet | Studying Mamet's work will offer valuable lessons in crafting sharp dialogue and exploring power dynamics, enhancing the writer's ability to create tension. |
Exercise | Practice writing dialogue-heavy scenes that focus on subtext and emotional depth.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will help the writer refine their dialogue skills, allowing for more nuanced character interactions and deeper emotional connections. |
Exercise | Write character backstories for secondary characters to explore their motivations and relationships.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will deepen character development and enhance the overall narrative by providing context for their actions and decisions. |
Exercise | Create a scene outline to improve pacing, ensuring that each beat serves the story and maintains audience engagement.Practice In SceneProv | This exercise will help the writer focus on the structure of their scenes, allowing for tighter pacing and more impactful storytelling. |
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Leaving Las Vegas | This film follows a suicidal alcoholic who moves to Las Vegas to drink himself to death. The themes of addiction, loneliness, and the complex relationship between a sex worker and a troubled man mirror the dynamics between Ben and Sera. |
Requiem for a Dream | Both stories explore the dark side of addiction and the impact it has on relationships. The characters' struggles with substance abuse and their desperate attempts to find connection in a chaotic world resonate throughout both narratives. |
The Wrestler | This film features a protagonist who grapples with personal demons and seeks redemption while navigating a world filled with vice and despair. The emotional vulnerability and the search for meaningful connections in the face of self-destruction are central themes in both stories. |
Trainspotting | Similar to Ben and Sera's story, this film delves into the lives of addicts in a gritty urban environment. The exploration of friendship, addiction, and the struggle for a better life parallels the characters' journeys in the screenplay. |
The Basketball Diaries | This coming-of-age story about a young man's descent into drug addiction and his struggles with identity and relationships reflects the themes of self-destruction and the search for connection found in Ben and Sera's narrative. |
Pulp Fiction | The intertwining stories of morally ambiguous characters in a crime-ridden world, along with the exploration of relationships formed in desperate circumstances, echo the dynamics between Ben and Sera as they navigate their troubled lives. |
A Streetcar Named Desire | This classic play features complex characters dealing with trauma, desire, and vulnerability. The relationship between Ben and Sera, marked by emotional turmoil and a search for connection, resonates with the themes of dependency and fragility in the play. |
The Virgin Suicides | This film explores themes of isolation, longing, and the impact of societal pressures on young women. The emotional depth and the portrayal of characters struggling with their circumstances parallel the experiences of Sera and Ben. |
Her | This film examines loneliness and the search for connection in a modern world. The emotional complexity of relationships and the characters' struggles with their identities resonate with Ben and Sera's journey. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
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The Downward Spiral | Ben's life deteriorates as he struggles with alcoholism, losing his job and relationships. | This trope involves a character experiencing a gradual decline in their life due to personal issues, often leading to tragic consequences. An example is the film 'Leaving Las Vegas,' where a man moves to Las Vegas to drink himself to death. |
The Hooker with a Heart of Gold | Sera, a sex worker, shows depth and vulnerability, revealing her desire for connection and love. | This trope portrays a sex worker as a sympathetic character who possesses moral integrity and kindness, often contrasting with their profession. An example is 'Pretty Woman,' where the protagonist is a sex worker who finds love and redemption. |
The Loveable Loser | Ben is portrayed as a charming but flawed character who struggles to get his life together. | This trope features a protagonist who is endearing despite their failures, often eliciting sympathy from the audience. An example is 'The 40-Year-Old Virgin,' where the main character's awkwardness and failures make him relatable. |
The Abusive Relationship | Sera's relationship with Yuri is marked by violence and manipulation. | This trope depicts a relationship characterized by one partner exerting control and abuse over the other. An example is 'The Color Purple,' where the protagonist endures abuse from her partner but ultimately seeks freedom. |
The Tragic Backstory | Both Ben and Sera have troubled pasts that inform their current struggles. | This trope involves characters with painful histories that shape their present behavior and choices. An example is 'Batman Begins,' where Bruce Wayne's traumatic childhood drives him to become Batman. |
The Misunderstood Artist | Ben's character reflects a creative spirit struggling with addiction and societal expectations. | This trope portrays artists as individuals who are often misunderstood and face challenges due to their creativity. An example is 'A Star is Born,' where the protagonist grapples with addiction while pursuing artistic success. |
The Femme Fatale | Sera's character initially appears seductive and mysterious, drawing Ben into her world. | This trope features a seductive woman who leads men into dangerous situations, often using her charm for manipulation. An example is 'Basic Instinct,' where the protagonist's allure hides darker intentions. |
The Road Trip | Ben's journey to Las Vegas symbolizes a quest for freedom and escape. | This trope involves characters embarking on a journey that leads to self-discovery and transformation. An example is 'Thelma & Louise,' where the protagonists' road trip leads to liberation and self-realization. |
The Last Chance | Ben's interactions with Sera represent his final opportunity for redemption and connection. | This trope involves a character facing a critical moment that could lead to redemption or downfall. An example is 'The Pursuit of Happyness,' where the protagonist's last chance at success drives the narrative. |
Theme | Theme Details | Themee Explanation | ||
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Addiction and Despair | Ben's alcoholism and Sera's involvement in sex work are central to their characters. | This theme explores how addiction affects personal relationships and leads to a cycle of despair. Both Ben and Sera are trapped in their respective addictions, which complicates their ability to connect meaningfully. | ||
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Loneliness and Isolation | Both Ben and Sera experience profound loneliness, despite being surrounded by people. | This theme highlights the emotional isolation that can exist even in crowded environments, emphasizing the characters' internal struggles. | ||
Redemption and Hope | Moments of vulnerability between Ben and Sera suggest a desire for redemption. | This theme reflects the characters' yearning for a better life and the hope that their connection might lead to healing. | ||
Power Dynamics in Relationships | The interactions between Sera and Yuri, as well as Ben and Sera, reveal complex power dynamics. | This theme examines how power imbalances affect relationships, particularly in the context of Sera's work and Ben's vulnerability. | ||
The Illusion of Glamour | The glamorous settings of Las Vegas contrast with the characters' grim realities. | This theme critiques the superficial allure of wealth and fame, revealing the emptiness behind the facade. |
Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
Site | Description |
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Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
Title | Description |
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Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
Voice Analysis | |
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Summary: | The writer's voice is characterized by sharp, introspective dialogue, vivid imagery, and a focus on the internal struggles of complex characters. The narrative style blends realism with emotional depth, creating a palpable tension that reflects the characters' vulnerabilities and moral ambiguities. This voice manifests through a mix of dark humor and poignant moments, inviting the audience to engage deeply with the characters' journeys. |
Voice Contribution | The writer's voice contributes to the script by enhancing the overall mood of unease and introspection, allowing themes of loneliness, addiction, and the search for connection to resonate powerfully. The nuanced dialogue and evocative descriptions create a rich emotional landscape, drawing the audience into the characters' internal conflicts and the complexities of their relationships. |
Best Representation Scene | 6 - Escapism in a Glass |
Best Scene Explanation | This scene is the best representation because it encapsulates the writer's unique voice through its vivid and provocative dialogue, immersive scene direction, and thematic depth. It highlights Ben's internal struggle between fantasy and reality, showcasing the emotional tension and complexity that define the screenplay. |
- Overall originality score: 8.5
- Overall originality explanation: The screenplay presents a rich tapestry of original themes and character dynamics, exploring addiction, vulnerability, and complex relationships in a nuanced manner. The authenticity of character interactions and the fresh perspectives on familiar settings and situations contribute significantly to its originality. The blend of dark humor with serious themes, along with the unique character arcs, enhances the screenplay's originality.
- Most unique situations: The most unique situations in the screenplay are Sera's complex relationship with Yuri, which showcases the dynamics of power and manipulation, and Ben's journey through addiction and self-destruction, particularly his candid discussions about his intentions to drink himself to death. Additionally, the portrayal of Sera's vulnerability and resilience in the face of violence and exploitation adds depth to the narrative.
- Overall unpredictability score: 7.5
- Overall unpredictability explanation: The screenplay maintains a level of unpredictability through its character choices and the unfolding of their relationships. While certain tropes are present, the characters' decisions often lead to unexpected outcomes, such as Ben's reckless behavior and Sera's responses to her circumstances. The intertwining of their lives and the potential for both connection and conflict keeps the audience engaged and guessing about the characters' fates.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
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internal Goals | Throughout the script, the protagonist Ben's internal goals evolve from a desperate need for alcohol and validation to a deeper desire for connection and healing. Initially, he seeks alcohol to escape his pain, reflected in interactions highlighting his loneliness. As the narrative progresses, his need for genuine emotional connection with Sera becomes more pronounced, showcasing his struggle with addiction and the search for redemption. |
External Goals | Ben's external goals shift from seeking immediate relief through alcohol and attention from women to trying to develop a meaningful relationship with Sera. Initially, he looks for temporary pleasures, but as the story unfolds, his objectives focus more on establishing a stable connection and overcoming the chaotic aspects of his life. |
Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict is between Freedom vs. Control. Ben is caught in a tumultuous struggle between his desire for personal freedom through reckless behavior and the control that addiction exerts over his life. This conflict intertwines with his journey as he grapples with the consequences of his choices while seeking validation and connection. |
Character Development Contribution: The evolution of Ben's goals illustrates a complex character arc, highlighting his transition from a self-destructive individual to someone who longs for connection, fostering growth amid chaos. This development deepens as he faces the emotional fallout of his choices and starts to recognize his vulnerabilities.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The interplay of goals and conflicts propels the narrative structure, creating pivotal moments where characters interact in meaningful ways that reflect their struggles and desires. The progression enhances pacing, leading to dramatic climaxes and moments of vulnerability that engage the audience.
Thematic Depth Contribution: The convergence of internal and external goals, alongside philosophical conflicts, adds thematic depth, exploring issues of addiction, the quest for redemption, and the complexities of human connection. These themes resonate throughout the script, prompting reflection on individual choices and societal judgments.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
Site | Description |
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Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
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How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
- Physical environment: The screenplay is set in a variety of locations, primarily in urban environments like Beverly Hills, Las Vegas, and Santa Monica. The physical characteristics range from high-end bars and luxurious penthouses to gritty motels and dark bars, creating a stark contrast between glamour and decay. The vibrant lights of Las Vegas and the desolate desert landscape serve as backdrops that reflect the characters' emotional states.
- Culture: Cultural elements in the screenplay include the superficiality of Hollywood, the allure of gambling in Las Vegas, and the complexities of relationships shaped by power dynamics and exploitation. The characters navigate a world where wealth, beauty, and status are highly valued, often leading to morally ambiguous choices. Themes of loneliness, addiction, and the search for connection are prevalent throughout the narrative.
- Society: The societal structure depicted in the screenplay is hierarchical and often exploitative, with clear divisions between the privileged and the marginalized. Characters like Sera and Ben grapple with their positions within this structure, facing societal judgment and personal struggles. The presence of Russian mobsters and the interactions between characters highlight the underlying corruption and danger in their world.
- Technology: Technological elements are minimal but present, including the use of phones, TVs, and cars, which serve to enhance the atmosphere and facilitate character interactions. The technology often reflects the characters' emotional states, such as Ben's reliance on alcohol and Sera's use of her appearance to navigate her environment.
- Characters influence: The unique physical environment, culture, and societal structures shape the characters' experiences and actions significantly. Ben's disheveled appearance and struggles with alcoholism are influenced by the superficiality of the high-end bar scene, while Sera's interactions with men reflect her precarious position in a society that objectifies her. Their choices are often driven by desperation and a desire for connection amidst their chaotic lives.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements contribute to the narrative by establishing a backdrop of tension and conflict. The contrasting settings of luxury and decay highlight the characters' internal struggles and the consequences of their choices. The screenplay's exploration of addiction, exploitation, and the search for redemption is deeply intertwined with the environments in which the characters operate.
- Thematic depth contribution: The world elements contribute to the thematic depth of the screenplay by emphasizing themes of isolation, vulnerability, and the human condition. The characters' interactions within the glamorous yet dangerous settings of Las Vegas and Los Angeles reflect broader societal issues, such as the impact of addiction, the quest for identity, and the complexities of love and connection in a fractured world.
central conflict
The central conflict revolves around Ben's struggle with alcoholism and self-destruction, juxtaposed with Sera's attempts to find stability and connection amidst her tumultuous life as a sex worker.
primary motivations
- Ben's desire to escape his painful reality through alcohol and self-sabotage.
- Sera's longing for love and acceptance while navigating her dangerous profession.
catalysts
- Ben's severance from his job, prompting his downward spiral.
- Sera's encounters with Yuri and the violent realities of her life, pushing her towards Ben.
barriers
- Ben's addiction and emotional turmoil prevent him from forming healthy relationships.
- Sera's abusive relationship with Yuri and societal stigma surrounding her profession hinder her ability to seek help.
themes
- The destructive nature of addiction and its impact on relationships.
- The search for love and connection in a world filled with pain and exploitation.
- The struggle for identity and self-worth amidst societal judgment.
stakes
The stakes involve Ben's potential death from alcoholism and Sera's safety and well-being in a dangerous environment, as well as their chance at finding genuine love and redemption.
uniqueness factor
The story uniquely intertwines the lives of two deeply flawed characters, exploring their vulnerabilities and the complexities of their relationship against the backdrop of Las Vegas's dark underbelly.
audience hook
The raw and emotional portrayal of addiction, love, and survival in a gritty setting keeps viewers engaged, as they root for the characters' redemption.
paradoxical engine or bisociation
The paradox lies in Ben's desire for freedom through self-destruction, which ultimately leads to his entrapment in a cycle of despair, while Sera's quest for love puts her in dangerous situations that threaten her autonomy.
paradoxical engine or bisociation 2
Another aspect of bisociation is the contrast between the glamorous facade of Las Vegas and the grim realities faced by the characters, highlighting the duality of their experiences and the societal pressures they navigate.
Engine: Claude
Recommend
Executive Summary
Leaving Las Vegas is a poignant character-driven drama that explores the complex and tragic relationship between an alcoholic screenwriter, Ben, and a prostitute, Sera, in Las Vegas. The screenplay is a showcase of exceptional writing, with a consistent tone, well-developed characters, and a compelling narrative that delves into themes of addiction, love, and the human condition. While the story can be emotionally challenging at times, it is a masterfully crafted piece that captivates the audience from start to finish.
- The screenplay opens with a strong, well-written sequence that introduces the protagonist, Ben, and his troubled state, setting the tone and mood for the story. The transition to the Las Vegas setting is also effectively established, creating a vivid backdrop for the narrative. high ( Scene 1 (1) Scene 2 (3) )
- The character development of Ben and Sera is exceptional, with their relationship evolving organically and the complexities of their individual struggles being deeply explored. The screenplay skillfully navigates the nuances of their connection, creating a powerful and emotionally resonant dynamic. high ( Scene 11 (16) Scene 12 (20) )
- The dialogue throughout the screenplay is sharp, authentic, and effectively conveys the characters' thoughts, emotions, and motivations. The interactions between Ben and Sera are particularly well-written, showcasing the depth of their understanding and connection. high ( Scene 31 (89) Scene 40 (118) )
- The screenplay's pacing is well-balanced, with a mix of quieter, introspective moments and more intense, dramatic scenes. This creates a compelling rhythm that keeps the audience engaged and invested in the story. medium ( Scene 6 (10) Scene 16 (25) )
- The ending of the screenplay is poignant and impactful, providing a fitting conclusion to Ben and Sera's tragic story. The final scenes effectively convey the bittersweet and profound impact of their relationship, leaving a lasting impression on the audience. high ( Scene 50 (146) )
- While the character development is generally strong, there are a few instances where the supporting characters, such as Yuri, could be further fleshed out to provide a more well-rounded understanding of their motivations and impact on the story. medium ( Scene 26 (64) )
- The transition between certain scenes could be smoother, with some jump cuts or abrupt changes in location or time that could benefit from additional connective tissue to maintain the flow of the narrative. medium ( Scene 33 (96) )
- Overall, the screenplay is comprehensive and does not have any glaring missing elements. The story is well-rounded and the character arcs are fully explored. low ( Scene - (-) )
- The surreal and dreamlike quality of Ben's hallucinations and fantasies are a standout element, providing a unique and engaging perspective on his deteriorating mental state and the impact of his alcoholism. high ( Scene 6 (10) )
- The screenplay's exploration of the themes of addiction, love, and the human condition is both profound and poignant, making it a thought-provoking and emotionally resonant piece of storytelling. high ( Scene 28 (77) )
- The screenplay's willingness to confront difficult and sensitive subject matter, such as the sexual assault Sera experiences, demonstrates a level of narrative bravery and a commitment to authentically depicting the harsh realities of the characters' lives. high ( Scene 59 (138) )
- Lack of Diversity The screenplay predominantly features white characters, with limited representation of other ethnicities or cultural backgrounds. While the focus is on the central relationship between Ben and Sera, expanding the diversity of the supporting characters could further enhance the screenplay's authenticity and representation. medium
- Occasional Repetitive Dialogue In a few instances, the dialogue between Ben and Sera can feel slightly repetitive, as they reiterate similar sentiments or explore the same themes in consecutive scenes. A more judicious editing approach could help streamline the dialogue and eliminate any unnecessary redundancy. low
Engine: GPT4
Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay for 'Leaving Las Vegas' presents a raw and poignant exploration of addiction, love, and despair through the lives of its two main characters, Ben and Sera. The character arcs are compelling, showcasing their struggles and the complexities of their relationship. While the narrative is engaging and thematically rich, there are areas for improvement in pacing and character development. Overall, the screenplay effectively captures the essence of its themes, though it could benefit from tightening certain plot points.
- The screenplay effectively establishes the characters' backgrounds and motivations early on, particularly through Ben's interactions in the bar and Sera's introduction in the hotel. This sets a strong foundation for their character arcs. high ( Scene 1 (INT. SMART BAR IN BEVERLY HILLS - NIGHT) Scene 3 (INT. PENTHOUSE SUITE OF HOTEL - NIGHT) )
- The emotional depth of the characters is well-developed, particularly in scenes where Ben and Sera share intimate moments. Their vulnerability and connection are palpable, enhancing the narrative's emotional impact. high ( Scene 26 (INT. BEN'S ROOM - NIGHT) Scene 78 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The dialogue is sharp and authentic, capturing the essence of the characters' struggles and their interactions. It effectively conveys their emotional states and the gravity of their situations. high ( Scene 41 (INT. BANK - DAY) Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The screenplay's visual imagery is striking, particularly in scenes that depict the stark contrast between the characters' internal struggles and the vibrant backdrop of Las Vegas. This enhances the thematic elements of escapism and despair. medium ( Scene 50 (EXT. DESERT LANDSCAPE WITH ROAD - DAY) )
- The climax of the screenplay is powerful and poignant, effectively encapsulating the tragic nature of the characters' lives and their relationship. It leaves a lasting impression on the audience. high ( Scene 111 (INT. SERA'S BEDROOM, LAS VEGAS - NIGHT) )
- Some scenes feel rushed, particularly those that transition between significant emotional moments. A more gradual build-up could enhance the impact of these pivotal scenes. medium ( Scene 12 (INT. SERA'S BEDROOM. LAS VEGAS - DAY) Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - DAY) )
- While the dialogue is strong, there are moments where it could be more concise. Some exchanges feel overly verbose, which can detract from the pacing. medium ( Scene 41 (INT. BANK - DAY) )
- The resolution of certain character arcs, particularly Sera's, feels somewhat abrupt. More exploration of her emotional journey could provide a more satisfying conclusion. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- There are instances where secondary characters could be more fleshed out. Providing more depth to these characters could enhance the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 41 (INT. BANK - DAY) )
- The pacing in the latter half of the screenplay slows down significantly, which may lead to audience disengagement. A more balanced pacing throughout could maintain engagement. medium ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- There is a lack of exploration into the backstories of secondary characters, particularly Yuri. Understanding his motivations could add depth to the narrative. medium ( Scene 12 (INT. SERA'S BEDROOM. LAS VEGAS - DAY) )
- The screenplay could benefit from a clearer exploration of the consequences of Ben's actions on Sera. This would enhance the emotional stakes of their relationship. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- There is a missed opportunity to delve deeper into the theme of redemption. Exploring how Ben's journey impacts his sense of self-worth could add layers to the narrative. medium ( Scene 41 (INT. BANK - DAY) )
- The screenplay lacks a strong sense of closure for Ben's character arc. A more definitive resolution could provide a more impactful ending. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The emotional aftermath of key events is not fully explored. Providing insight into the characters' feelings post-events could enhance the narrative's emotional depth. medium ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The use of voice-over effectively conveys the internal struggles of the characters, adding depth to their emotional states. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The screenplay's exploration of addiction is both raw and honest, providing a realistic portrayal of its impact on relationships. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The juxtaposition of the vibrant Las Vegas setting against the dark themes of addiction and despair creates a compelling contrast. medium ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The emotional climax of the screenplay is powerful, effectively capturing the tragic nature of the characters' lives. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- The screenplay's ability to evoke empathy for its flawed characters is a significant strength, making their struggles relatable. high ( Scene 90 (INT. SERA'S HOUSE - NIGHT) )
- Character Motivation The motivations of secondary characters, particularly Yuri, are not fully explored, leaving gaps in understanding their impact on the main characters. This lack of depth can detract from the overall narrative. medium
- Pacing Issues Certain scenes feel rushed or overly drawn out, particularly in the latter half of the screenplay. This inconsistency in pacing can disrupt the flow of the narrative and affect audience engagement. medium
Engine: DeepSeek
Highly Recommend
Executive Summary
The screenplay 'Leaving Las Vegas' is a deeply emotional and raw portrayal of two broken individuals finding solace in each other amidst their self-destructive paths. The narrative is consistently powerful, with strong character arcs and thematic depth. The pacing is well-balanced, though some scenes could benefit from tighter editing. The dialogue is authentic and poignant, driving the story forward with emotional intensity. The screenplay's unique selling proposition lies in its unflinching honesty and the chemistry between the protagonists, making it a compelling piece of storytelling.
- The chemistry between Ben and Sera is palpable and drives the emotional core of the story. Their interactions are authentic and deeply moving. high ( Scene 26 (59) Scene 27 (61) )
- The portrayal of Ben's alcoholism is brutally honest and adds a layer of realism to the narrative. His descent is both tragic and compelling. high ( Scene 12 (20) Scene 19 (40) )
- Sera's character arc is well-developed, showing her vulnerability and strength. Her past trauma and current struggles are handled with sensitivity. high ( Scene 33 (77) Scene 34 (78) )
- The screenplay's climax is emotionally devastating and perfectly executed, leaving a lasting impact on the audience. high ( Scene 56 (128) Scene 57 (131) )
- The opening scenes effectively set the tone for the story, introducing the protagonists and their worlds with precision and emotional depth. medium ( Scene 1 (1) Scene 2 (2) )
- Some scenes in the middle act feel slightly repetitive and could benefit from tighter editing to maintain momentum. medium ( Scene 45 (96) )
- The violent encounter with the college boys is intense but could be more nuanced to avoid feeling overly sensational. medium ( Scene 55 (126) )
- The transition to Las Vegas could be smoother to better establish the change in setting and tone. low ( Scene 24 (50) )
- Ben's sudden decision to move in with Sera could use more buildup to feel more organic. low ( Scene 38 (86) )
- The subplot with Yuri could be more fleshed out to add depth to Sera's backstory. medium ( Scene 52 (119) )
- More backstory on Ben's past and what led him to his self-destructive path would add depth to his character. medium
- A clearer resolution for Sera's character after Ben's death would provide more closure. medium
- More exploration of the supporting characters, like Yuri, could enrich the narrative. low
- Additional scenes showing Ben's attempts to quit drinking could add complexity to his struggle. low
- A stronger sense of place for Las Vegas as a character in the story could enhance the atmosphere. low
- The intimate scenes between Ben and Sera are handled with sensitivity and authenticity, avoiding clichés. high ( Scene 27 (61) )
- The brutal attack on Sera is a turning point in the narrative, showcasing her resilience. high ( Scene 56 (128) )
- Ben's final moments are heartbreaking and perfectly capture the tragedy of his character. high ( Scene 60 (143) )
- The opening scene effectively establishes Ben's character and his downward spiral. medium ( Scene 1 (1) )
- The reunion between Ben and Sera after their separation is emotionally charged and well-executed. medium ( Scene 33 (77) )
- Character Backstory The screenplay could delve deeper into Ben's past to provide more context for his self-destructive behavior. While his alcoholism is well-portrayed, the roots of his despair are only hinted at. medium
- Supporting Characters Characters like Yuri and the college boys are underdeveloped, serving more as plot devices than fully realized individuals. More depth here could enrich the narrative. low
- Dialogue Repetition Some lines of dialogue, particularly in the middle act, feel repetitive and could be trimmed for tighter pacing. low
- Scene Transitions A few scene transitions are abrupt, disrupting the flow of the narrative. Smoother transitions would enhance readability. low
Memorable lines in the script:
Scene Number | Line |
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40 | Sera: I love you. |
15 | Ben: I really wish that you'd come home with me. You're so cute and I'm really good in bed... believe me... you smell good too... |
36 | Sera: The only thing I have to come home to is a bottle of Listerine to wash the taste of come out of my mouth. I'm tired of being alone... that's what I'm tired of. |
4 | YURI: Is this how you would repay me for coming all this way to find you again? Driving through the desert to protect my little Sera. |
25 | BEN: I wonder if you'll take two hundred and fifty dollars to fuck me? |